text:
Before I share this story I must let you know I am in a dark place in my life. My fiancee broke off the engagement New Years Day. I am working on things day by day and I am getting the treatment to help me with it. So do not be worried for the most part.

I never really wrote growing up but I feel like this is going to be good for me till I get better.

Thank you for reading, and this is a **ROUGH DRAFT** and written on Notepad because that's all I have right now.

"My Day called Regrets"

The year is 2013, and I have made bad deciesions in my past and it is time to get everything straightened out.

It is a cold winters day, and I fight to open my eyes to the sunlight because it is another day of feeling the way I always do. The windows do not hold the cold out and it blows in under my blanket and lets me know I feel still. I let out a Sigh... and I wish things were different... but they aren't. I hurt people and destroyed futures. These things go through my mind every other thought durning my time of being awake. When I fall to sleep I am awoken by a racing heart beat and fear of not knowing how to fix things I thought I could.

As I wonder why I still get up, I make my way to the hoodie laying next to me. It is thick and is the only thing showing warmth to me in this time of cold. My day is filled with pain and trying to not tear up at every though of my past. I get ready for work like everyone else. I am listening to music where the screaming is ecspressing my inner voice and hurt from ex-girlfriends and past lovers who are now a distant memory of the singers past life. I feel his pain and wish everything was better.

I gather my things and head off to my third shift factory job and get ready for another slow night of work knowing the only things my mind will be thinking of are the things I wish it didn't. I put on a show for my co-workers, smiling... laughing... but the few people who know my pain know I am crying inside. I turn away more often then normal to wipe away the few forceful tears that leave my eyes. With everything going on I pretend to chuckle at the poorly told joke told to mee to try and cheer me up. It does not work and I just look away and get back to my work. Trying to focus on the job at hand and keeping as busy as I can to repress the ideas and memories. The night rolls on and everything at work is moving at a slugish pace and I have done all I can to keep busy, so I stand. I stand and just look out into nothingness, thinking, feeling pain I wish I have never felt.

The time is 5am and it is almost time to get done with work. The thought of sleep seems so good, but the dreams to come will keep me up. I shuffle to my locker looking at only where I need to walk not paying attention to the things around me, people, and machines. I kick off my boots knowing that the day is done and I can try and relax. Relaxation is just a distant memory I have not felt in a long time. It hurts. Everytihng hurts. I hate my job and the place I live. But I can not just leave and walk away. My gloves and heavy jacket help me get past the cold winter morning as I walk to my car.

The worst part of going home is knowing the heat from my ex lover is no longer there, and it is filled with the cold and emptieness of my bed. I try to keep warm by holding a pillow as close as possible. It does not help and only makes me feel worse. I hate this. But I need to work on myself before I can even think about looking for someone to try and feel happy with. It will contiune to be cold. I lay cold and alone waiting for my eyes to get heavy. The sand man must be stuck in traffic because my eyes will not get tierd and my pain will not subside. The tears help pull me towards sleep and I know it is another day that I will try to forget. This is just my day called regrets, and I am gone to wake again and repeat it.

title: "My day called Regrets" Rough Draft

question: Describe the narrator's routine

answer:
and overall state of mind.

The narrator seems to feel lost and overwhelmed by their regrets, attempting to stay busy in order to push the thoughts to the back of their mind. They go through a routine of going to work (often feeling tired and sluggish while there), coming home to be alone in a dark and cold space, and eventually succumbing to sleep while continuing to suffer through their unhappy thoughts.

text: Part of the question is included in the answer - could cut 'and overall state of mind'

refinement: The narrator seems to feel lost and overwhelmed by their regrets, attempting to stay busy in order to push the thoughts to the back of their mind. They go through a routine of going to work (often feeling tired and sluggish while there), coming home to be alone in a dark and cold space, and eventually succumbing to sleep while continuing to suffer through their unhappy thoughts.

text: The narrator's routine is not as clearly or comprehensively stated as it could be.

refinement: The narrator seems to feel lost and overwhelmed by their regrets, attempting to stay busy in order to push the thoughts to the back of their mind. They wake up in pain, go to work at the night shift at a factory(often feeling tired and sluggish while there), coming home to be alone in a dark and cold space, and eventually succumbing to sleep while continuing to suffer through their unhappy thoughts.

text: Could develop the narrator's mindset a bit more.

refinement: The narrator seems to feel lost and overwhelmed by their regrets, especially around a failed relationship, attempting to stay busy in order to push the thoughts to the back of their mind, and hiding their pain from coworkers. They wake up in pain, go to work at the night shift at a factory(often feeling tired and sluggish while there), coming home to be alone in a dark and cold space, and eventually succumbing to sleep while continuing to suffer through their unhappy thoughts.

text: 'My day is filled with pain and trying to not tear up at every though of my past.' is evidence the narrator is full of regret

text: 'Trying to focus on the job at hand and keeping as busy as I can to repress the ideas and memories.' is evidence of the narrator attempting to stay busy and push thoughts to the back of their mind.

answer:
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The narrator's routine usually starts off with waking up and doing their day job. At night, they find comfort in the silence of their bed, despite the loneliness that comes with it. The narrator longs for peace but their mind is constantly preoccupied with regrets from their past, causing the person to stay up all night long.

text: Could describe the routine more comprehensively.

refinement:
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The narrator's routine usually starts off with getting out of bed reluctantly and working the night shift at a a factory. At night, they find comfort in the silence of their bed, despite the loneliness that comes with it. The narrator longs for peace but their mind is constantly preoccupied with regrets from their past, causing the person to stay up all night long.

text: It is incorrect to say that the narrator finds comfort in their bed; the last paragraph makes it clear that they get no relief from the cold and emptiness of their bed.

refinement:
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The narrator's routine usually starts off with getting out of bed reluctantly and working the night shift at a a factory. At night, they rue the coldness and emptiness of their bed, now that their lover is gone, and cry themselves to sleep. The narrator longs for peace but their mind is constantly preoccupied with regrets from their past, causing the person to stay up all night long.

text: Removal of extraneous full stop at the beginning.

refinement: The narrator's routine usually starts off with getting out of bed reluctantly and working the night shift at a a factory. At night, they rue the coldness and emptiness of their bed, now that their lover is gone, and cry themselves to sleep. The narrator longs for peace but their mind is constantly preoccupied with regrets from their past, causing the person to stay up all night long.

text: 'When I fall to sleep I am awoken by a racing heart beat and fear of not knowing how to fix things I thought I could' is evidence the narrator struggles to fall asleep because of thoughts of their past.

answer: The narrator wakes up while it is still daylight, gets dressed and ready for this night-shift at a factory. He attends his job as socialises as best he can with his co-workers, finishing his shift at 5am when he kicks off his boots and heads home.

text: It's not clear that the narrator does socialise with their co-workers, or simply puts on a brave face.

refinement: The narrator wakes up while it is still daylight, gets dressed and ready for this night-shift at a factory. He attends his job and puts on a cheerful facade in front of co-workers, finishing his shift at 5am when he kicks off his boots and heads home.

text: Could flesh out the routine more comprehensively.

refinement: The narrator wakes up while it is still daylight, gets dressed and ready for this night-shift at a factory. He attends his job and puts on a cheerful facade in front of co-workers, finishing his shift at 5am when he kicks off his boots and heads home, but struggles to fall asleep.

text: The narrator's gender is not explicitly stated in the passage.

refinement: The narrator wakes up while it is still daylight, gets dressed and ready for this night-shift at a factory. They attends their job and put on a cheerful facade in front of co-workers, finishing their shift at 5am when they kicks off their boots and head home, but struggle to fall asleep.

text: 'I gather my things and head off to my third shift factory job and get ready for another slow night of work' shows the narrator works the night shift at a factory

question: What indicates the narrator is depressed?

answer: His lack of positivity, he wakes up worried about things he cannot control and pretends to be happy to those around him. He gets no joy out of anything he does and feels as though he is simply going through the motions. He feels like nothing can possibly change the way he feels even though that's all he wants.

text: The narrator's difficulty with sleeping should be mentioned (given how the passage focuses on it)

refinement: His lack of positivity, he wakes up worried about things he cannot control and pretends to be happy to those around him. He gets no joy out of anything he does and feels as though he is simply going through the motions. He feels like nothing can possibly change the way he feels even though that's all he wants. He struggles to sleep and he is kept awake by thoughts of regret and anxiety.

text: The narrator's gender is not explicitly stated.

refinement: Their lack of positivity, they wake up worried about things they cannot control and pretend to be happy to those around them. They gets no joy out of anything they do and feel as though they are simply going through the motions. They feel like nothing can possibly change the way they feel even though that's all they want. They struggle to sleep and are kept awake by thoughts of regret and anxiety.

text: 'I put on a show for my co-workers, smiling... laughing' is evidence the narrator pretends to be happy to those around them.

text: 'Everytihng hurts. I hate my job and the place I live. But I can not just leave and walk away.' is evidence the narrator feels like they cannot change things for the better.

answer:
-The narrator talks about past bad decisions and sleep deprivation that prevents them from getting a good night's rest.
-The narrator talks about feeling abandoned by their ex and not being able to go out and enjoy things in life like relationships.
-The narrator talks about their day at their factory job and their life at home and how it is just more pain.

text: Could develop the last point more on the pain the narrator feels.

refinement:
-The narrator talks about past bad decisions and sleep deprivation that prevents them from getting a good night's rest.
-The narrator talks about feeling abandoned by their ex and not being able to go out and enjoy things in life like relationships.
-The narrator talks about their day at their factory job and their life at home and how it is just more pain - they feel they have no control over their life, and their day is dominated by loneliness and tears.

text: 'The worst part of going home is knowing the heat from my ex lover is no longer there, and it is filled with the cold and emptieness of my bed.' is evidence the narrator feels abandoned by their ex

text: 'When I fall to sleep I am awoken by a racing heart beat and fear of not knowing how to fix things I thought I could.' is evidence the narrator struggles to fall asleep and thoughts of their past.

answer: The narrator is unhappy by talking about how he is shaggy and unable to connect with people and his job.

text: It's not clear what 'shaggy' means in this context.

refinement: The narrator is unhappy by talking about how he is unable to connect with people and his job.

text: The narrator's gender is not explicitly stated.

refinement: The narrator is unhappy by talking about how they are unable to connect with people and their job.

text: The examples of the narrator being depressed could be developed in much more detail.

refinement: The narrator is unhappy by talking about how they are unable to connect with people and their job, putting on a cheerful facade but at the same time experiencing pain and regret throughout the day. The narrator also talks about their difficulties with sleeping and loneliness after their ex left them.

text: Grammatical improvements needed at the start.

refinement: The narrator shows their unhappiness by talking about how they are unable to connect with people and their job, putting on a cheerful facade but at the same time experiencing pain and regret throughout the day. The narrator also talks about their difficulties with sleeping and loneliness after their ex left them.

text: 'I pretend to chuckle at the poorly told joke told to mee to try and cheer me up. It does not work and I just look away and get back to my work.' is evidence the narrator feels that interactions with co-workers are forced and they are unable to connect with people.

question: Write a ~3 sentence summary.

answer: The narrator's ex-fiance had broken off their engagement on New Year's Day. The narrator describes the emotions that they feel everyday (mostly regret). The narrator returns to their bedroom, cold and alone, and knows that it is another day that they will try to forget.

text: While the preamble at the start of the passage suggests the author's ex-fiance broke of their engagement, it's not clear that this is also true for the narrator within the story.

refinement: The narrator describes the emotions that they feel everyday (mostly regret). The narrator returns to their bedroom, cold and alone, and knows that it is another day that they will try to forget.

text: The narrator's routine (going to work) is omitted.

refinement: The narrator describes the emotions that they feel everyday (mostly regret). They go to work the night shift at a factory, putting on a brave face for coworkers and trying to repress their pain and regret. The narrator returns to their bedroom, cold and alone, and knows that it is another day that they will try to forget.

text: 'I know it is another day that I will try to forget. ' is evidence the narrator is attempting to forget

text: 'it is filled with the cold and emptieness of my bed. ' is evidence the narrator feels cold and alone

answer: The narrator suffers from depression. They seem to regret a number of things from their past, and when their ex-girlfriend broke off the engagement they experienced a major breakdown. Despite finally finding a therapist, the narrator feels like they aren't much closer to finding hope.

text: Much of what is described about the narrator - regret from their ex-girlfriend breaking off their engagement, finding a therapist - appear to apply to the author (judging from the preamble) but not to the narrator within the context of the story.

refinement: The narrator suffers from depression. They seem to regret a number of things from their past, and feel like they aren't much closer to finding hope.

text: More could be done to flesh out the narrator's routine and feelings while they go through it.

refinement: The narrator suffers from depression. They seem to regret a number of things from their past, and struggle working their night shift job at a factory. When they return home, they feel lonely from the loss of their ex-lover and cry themselves to sleep.

text: 'trying to not tear up at every though of my past.' is evidence the narrator regrets things from their past.

answer: The unnamed narrator stays awake thinking about their regrets. On a cold winter day, the narrator catches the bus to their job and our work collecting. The narrator gets off work early so they can go home in time to rest their eyes.

text: The details about the narrator getting the work / finishing work are incorrect

refinement: The unnamed narrator stays awake thinking about their regrets.

text: The narrator's emotions and routine could be developed more.

refinement: The unnamed narrator stays awake thinking about their regrets. At their night job at a factory, they put on a cheerful facade in front of co-workers and try to keep themselves busy to repress their thoughts. When they return home they cry themselves to sleep in a cold and empty bed.

text: 'When I fall to sleep I am awoken by a racing heart beat and fear of not knowing how to fix things I thought I could.' indicates the narrator is kept awake by their regrets.

answer: The narrator recounts a specific day out of many in which he struggles to cope with the loss of his ex-fiance and employment. He willingly holds onto pain from prior relationships and his lack of current fulfillment combined with the cold weather of winter. His daily routine and experiences are the same, and he seems to stay in this cycle forever.

text: The narrator has not lost their job, and the loss of their ex-fiance seems to apply to the author, not the narrator.

refinement: The narrator recounts a specific day out of many in which he struggles to cope with regret and depression. He willingly holds onto pain from prior relationships and his lack of current fulfillment combined with the cold weather of winter. His daily routine and experiences are the same, and he seems to stay in this cycle forever.

text: The gender of the narrator is not explicit from the passage.

refinement: The narrator recounts a specific day out of many in which they struggle to cope with regret and depression. They willingly hold onto pain from prior relationships and their lack of current fulfillment combined with the cold weather of winter. Their daily routine and experiences are the same, and they seem to stay in this cycle forever.

text: Could reduce some of the repetition and develop the narrator's experience at their job more

refinement: The narrator recounts a specific day out of many in which they struggle to cope with regret and depression. They willingly hold onto pain from prior relationships and their lack of current fulfillment combined with the cold weather of winter. Their daily routine (working the night shift, struggling to fall asleep after) and experiences are the same, and they seem to stay in this cycle forever.

text: It's not clear that the narrator does hold onto pain from prior relationships

refinement: The narrator recounts a specific day out of many in which they struggle to cope with regret and depression. They recall the pain from prior relationships and their lack of current fulfillment combined with the cold weather of winter. Their daily routine (working the night shift, struggling to fall asleep after) and experiences are the same, and they seem to stay in this cycle forever.

text: 'I hate my job and the place I live. But I can not just leave and walk away. ' suggests the narrator is stuck in a routine / cycle

answer:
The narrator is attempting to write themselves a note. Most of the things they write are filled with regret stemming from missed opportunities and failed relationships, and they believe they haven't passed the chance to make things right.
They reflect on their job, a crazy factory night shift where they amuse their co-workers with their brokenhearted laughter.

text: The author is writing on Notepad but the narrator is not shown to be writing a note.

refinement:
The narrator is filled with regret stemming from missed opportunities and failed relationships, and they believe they haven't passed the chance to make things right.
They reflect on their job, a crazy factory night shift where they amuse their co-workers with their brokenhearted laughter.

text: The narrator doesn't amuse their co-workers with their laughter but responds with laughter to hide their misery.

refinement:
The narrator is filled with regret stemming from missed opportunities and failed relationships, and they believe they haven't passed the chance to make things right.
They reflect on their job, a factory night shift where they pretend to laugh at their co-workers' jokes to hide their pain.

text: More detail on the narrator's struggle with sleep could be included.

refinement: The narrator is filled with regret stemming from missed opportunities and failed relationships, and they believe they haven't passed the chance to make things right. They reflect on their job, a factory night shift where they pretend to laugh at their co-workers' jokes to hide their pain. They struggle to sleep, finding their bed cold and empty, and often crying themselves to sleep.

text: Some grammatical amendments.

refinement: The narrator is filled with regret stemming from missed opportunities and failed relationships, and they believe they haven't ever had the opportunity to make things right. They reflect on their job, a factory night shift where they pretend to laugh at their co-workers' jokes to hide their pain. They struggle to sleep, finding their bed cold and empty, and often crying themselves to sleep.

text: 'When I fall to sleep I am awoken by a racing heart beat and fear of not knowing how to fix things I thought I could.' suggests the narrator is filled with regret

answer: The story of a man who is going through the throes of depression. He has broken up with his girlfriend, works nights in a factory and is hurting. The man appears to accept that it is his fat to simply repeat the cycle.

text: The gender of the narrator or their ex is not explicit in the passage.

refinement: The story of a person who is going through the throes of depression. They have broken up with their ex, work nights in a factory and are hurting. The narrator appears to accept that it is their fat to simply repeat the cycle.

text: Could flesh out the narrator's situation more

refinement: The story of a person who is going through the throes of depression. They have broken up with their ex, work nights in a factory, struggle to sleep and are hurting throughout every waking moment. The narrator appears to accept that it is their fat to simply repeat the cycle.

text: Spelling correction to 'fate'

refinement: The story of a person who is going through the throes of depression. They have broken up with their ex, work nights in a factory, struggle to sleep and are hurting. The narrator appears to accept that it is their fate to simply repeat the cycle.

text: 'This is just my day called regrets, and I am gone to wake again and repeat it' is evidence the narrator feels like they are doomed to repeat a cycle


split: train

text:
Benji Kingsley

I snatched up Sunday’s sports section and peeled it open to a random page, holding it taught and high and close enough to my face that the words went double. I sank low into my chair and prayed—please, oh please, for the love of all that’s Holy, don’t let him see me. I felt unnatural and foolish but, most of all, safe from an awkward encounter with a guy who never ever seeing again had become one of my life’s major goals. I didn’t need to look up. I already knew.  I put down the paper, and as sure as hellfire singes ass-hair, Benji Kingsley was standing there looking down at me (I never hated a man as much). “What was the score?” He asked.

“A lot to a little!” I said as sarcastically and dismissive as I could.

 See, Bengji Kingsley was the kid who was always last one picked to a team for Battleball. Not because he was slow or fat or grossly incompetent, which he was, but because he was a loathsome, obnoxious scoundrel. He was a prankster and a good one, too. No one was safe. He would steal for the sake of stealing, never keeping anything he stole unless to frame someone else for the crime. He would alter another student’s answers before passing their exam forward. I remember he once stole official school stationary and sent out letters to parents regarding their child’s excessive absences. Sometimes he would bring the teachers flowers or candies, never out of kindness I’m sure. If he wasn’t playing pranks, then he was showing off with some outwardly disgusting act, like drinking the last sip of soda from a bottle then spitting it back into the container, then drinking it again and spitting it, again and again. Everyone hated him. Any kid would have given anything just to have the opportunity of hurling a blood-red, rough-skinned ball of compressed air and hatred at his pudgy melon-head..

He looked completely different than the way I remembered him. He was trim, not fat, dressed in a beige suit and light blue undershirt. He looked better than nice. He looked important. Uninvited, he sat in the chair at the side of my table rather than the one across it and flagged one of the young waitresses walking by. “Excuse me, sweetheart, won’t you get my friend here another margarita, and I’ll have a glass of ice water, with lemon if you’d please.”

 “Actually, I was just leaving.”

“No, stay, I insist,” he said. “I won’t take up much of your time.” I said nothing, wearing my impatience on the outside.  “I’ll get right to it, then. Over the past year I’ve been a part of a twelve step recovery proam, and—”

“AA.? But I remember you saying you were allergic to alcohol.”

“I am. I never touch the stuff. But it’s become a way to redemption for me, all the same.”

“Let me guess—you’re on the step that requires you to personally confront everyone you’ve wronged and apologize.

"Bingo.”

“How are you ever going to find the time?” I teased.

The waitress came back with our drinks, and Benji quickly jotted a note on a napkin and handed it to her along with a hundred dollar bill. The girl was as stunned as I was. She read the note and looked at him and then looked at me and then back at him. He seemed to nod, but perhaps not. After she left he went on with his apology, it was something that I had long since forgotten about. The waitress came back with the check which Benji paid and slipped the girl another hundred dollars, which she pocketed guiltily. We said our goodbyes, shook hands, he left, and that was that. Leaving the café feeling quite good, happy to know that even the worst kind of guy can turn things around, I couldn’t help but notice some kids through the café’s window, pointing and laughing. I felt they might be laughing at me, but I quickly dismissed it because the window was probably mirror-tinted on the inside.

I hoped the window was mirror-tinted on the inside.

title: Dead Wings Still Soar Benji Kingsley

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about the narrator's relationship with Benji?

answer: The narrator tells a story about him and Benji when they were younger. Benji is infamous for being fat and for ruining other children's childhoods. Back then, no one wanted to play with him and he was the only boy singled out for wearing hideous, outdated clothes not bought by his parents. He is also known as a prankster. He would steal candy bars and strawberries and throw them at classmates. The narrator could have also forgotten Benjis's last name and isn't very detailed with the language used to describe him. The left a chilling impression on his fellow schoolmates and everyone dreaded his jumprope demonstrations circulating in the classroom to show off his gross bodily fluids.

text: The response includes details that are not evidenced in the passage and possibly untrue.

refinement: The narrator tells a story about him and Benji when they were younger. Benji is infamous for being fat and for ruining other children's childhoods. Back then, no one wanted to play with him, he is also known as a prankster.

answer: The narrator has a negative opinion of Benji and is surprised to see that he has changed for the better. The relationship between the two characters is based on uncomfortable antagonism. The narrator wishes Benji would go away and sees his presence as a disruption.

answer: The narrator sees Benji in a bar and tries to avoid him, but Benji insists that they have a drink together. The narrator and Benji used to go to school together, and the narrator recalls that no one loved Benji because he was a prankster. Benji tells the narrator that he wants to apologize to him for something he did a long time ago. Later, the narrator leaves the bar and sees some kids through the bar’s window, pointing and laughing. It seems     Benji pranked him again.

answer: The story portrays the narrator's relationship with Benji as having always been hostile. The narrator specifically remembers him as someone who would constantly play pranks and be obnoxious. However, after some time away and undergoing substance abuse treatment, Benji emerges as a much changed person who apologizes to people and pays a great deal of attention and respect to those around him. The story suggests that the narrator is not entirely thrilled with this development because he/she continues to harbor animosity towards Benji. The relationship between them can thus be described as contentious.

answer: The narrator and Benji have known each other for a long time. The narrator graduated from high school before Benji, who is ten years his junior. However, from the story, it seems the narrator and Benji have always had a complicated relationship. Although the story describes Benji as a dyspeptic, rank-conscious, selfish, lying, malicious idiot, it seems that the narrator and Benji have often sparred against each other on the schoolyard.

text: The response includes details that are not evidenced in the passage.

refinement: From the story, it seems the narrator and Benji have always had a complicated relationship. Although the story describes Benji as a dyspeptic, rank-conscious, selfish, lying, malicious idiot, it seems that the narrator and Benji have often sparred against each other on the schoolyard.


text:
The sky is poetic when you consider it emotionally: sunsets draw tears and rolling tongues of clouds pull mouths open and vicious, wandering storms inspire dizzying cries for God or help or *someone*.

I am not poetic.

This is what makes me stare at the cottage-cheese ceiling in my room at night and wonder why I will never admire myself. I conjure you and watch you effortlessly twist nails into your hands, watch the wounds bleed ink and meaning, because you always told me you admired me but I never believed you, and the way your eyes would look not into me but behind me made me nervous and I think that’s why you could never really love me.

But I tried.

*Fuck you* I tried.

I tried and then I told myself that your angled good looks were beyond me and that your ancient, slippery tongue would never find mine and then I ached until I could convince myself of some flaw you weren’t aware of. I tangled myself into tight enough knots that I couldn’t walk straight and I couldn’t unwind myself for long enough to make hollow conversation or take deep enough breaths.

I wanted your easy wit and your offensive charm but I wanted you to give it to me like a lesson so I could hang it on the wall like a picture and remember the time I fell in love with the idea of a boy. And I didn’t care that I knew you would never feel awful, rooted things for me. I never cared about that.

And I made like I was finding myself or something because your body sitting next to mine made me feel shallow and hopeless and all I wanted to do was be *your* type of person and then you would let me crawl inside of you and decipher your secrets for myself.

You were different than anyone I knew with your swarming lies and your spangled lines of art and people and pale, tortured love stories. You drew me in with those choked eyes of yours like the depths of you were hungry for something you knew you would never have.

Storms strike first from a distance: all swirling, coked-up air and this graceful, rhythmic dance between high and low pressure that spins so far out of control it makes hearts grow restless even when all you can see of it makes it look like a gray, stretched-out cotton ball. I watch cagey men on National Geographic. I watch them crawl in head-first, greedy-eyed. I cringe at their middle fingers raised to the clouded sun.

You gutted me.

You gutted me and you didn’t realize that you’d done it because I didn’t turn myself inside-out for you like you thought I did. I absorbed you and leaked you back out and you smiled at me as if to say *you’re the girl I’ve been waiting for* and I was so drunk with your approval that I couldn’t look at my toenails without seeing them through your eyes.

But my heart pounded with each inch you let me head in your direction and you welcomed me with your spinning, wild arms and I smiled at you as if to say *you get all of me but you don’t get to know why* because that was my idea of mystery.

You didn’t ask questions.

I watch storm chasers and I watch twisters pick up houses and cows and spit them back out crumbled and worthless. I watch how the air, coiling, grins and doesn’t stop. I watch adrenaline-junkies point their cameras and get the shot and I watch their smiles: that kid on Christmas morning clutching a toy helicopter like it’s all he’s ever going to need.

I haven’t moved from this place since you left.

If I move I’ll get caught up in your backlash and your intelligent, twitching fingers with those sweet, tidy good-byes of yours. I’ll gag on the memory of you and your drugged march because you had to be going somewhere always, forced to inhale the comforting slant of your whole body, the one I knew like the curve of my own reflection.

I remember you gave me a notebook once, and you wrote my name in your earnest chicken scratch on the inside of the sturdy red cover and you told me *go crazy* but I didn’t. I sat and watched you scribble yourself into oblivion on your own blank pages. I could never dream up enough words to write a good sentence. You thought we were kindred, back then. You told me not to look for it, just to find it, and I would know. You told me a lot of things and I remember them all, but your words sit beside me like a pale sketch of you, eyes wide and shoulders slack. For a long time your words filled me up but now they’re just scraps of your character that I can’t seem to hide anywhere.

Sometimes I wish you were still here but mostly the riprap of ripped-up ground and shattered houses you have left me with feel like home enough to crawl into and sleep. The imprint of your body here is big enough so the sheets puff thick around my head and I’ll never have to breathe again.

You were poetic enough for the both of us.

title: Riprap

question: Who is the narrator talking about?

answer: Not answered explicitly, but the narrator seems to be speaking about a former romantic partner

text: No content

answer: the boy that broke the narrator's heart

question: Why did the person the narrator is talking about treat the narrator in this manner?

answer: Not answered

answer: The person the narrator is talking about treated the person with like cold disdain because they felt they were too far above the narrator in terms of intelligence and class. This caused the narrator to initially feel dazzled and drawn in, but as the relationship progressed the person grew tired of the poverty-stricken person and ultimately broke up with them.

text: This is not entirely an accurate depiction of the relationship

refinement: The person the narrator is talking about said he loved the narrator but she could not make it work because she felt too conflicted about herself and everything else. The relationship was complicated.

answer: Based on the opinionated and emotional description of the relationship between the two people in this passage, it seems that they likely broke up because the person who left did so because they believed they were better than the narrator. They treated the narrator like they were insignificant because they did not display the same level of emotions as the person they were with.

text: Not quite accurate, it's not clear they broke up because they felt better than the narrator.

refinement: Based on the opinionated and emotional description of the relationship between the two people in this passage, it seems that they likely broke up because the person who left had taken advantage of the narrator without knowing it because she did not have a good enough sense of self-worth.

question: What kind of person is the narrator talking about?

answer: The narrator seems to be describing a person who keeps going despite obstacles - someone who can weather intense emotional turmoil. The narrator seems to imply that the person they are describing is strong-willed and fearless, someone who doesn't give up even in the face of adversity.

text: The narrator is not speaking positively about their former partner.

refinement: The narrator seems to be describing a person who is a poet, an artist, fickle and not what they seem.

answer: Not answered

answer: The narrator seems to be describing someone who inflicts harm on themselves, either emotionally or physically, without realizing the extent of the damage they've done. They might be described as someone who is self-destructive or self-hating.

text: Self destructive is a description of the narrator, not the ex boyfriend.

refinement: The narrator seems to be describing someone who inflicts harm on others, either emotionally or physically, without realizing the extent of the damage they've done.

question: Where is the narrator?

answer: Not answered

text: There is enough circumstantial evidence in the story to answer this.

refinement: They are sleeping in the same bed their ex slept in.

answer: Unclear, but they seem to be inside their own room.

answer: They are sleeping in the same bed where their ex slept.

question: Write a ~1 sentence summary.

answer: The story describes how the narrator, a young woman, got left behind by her boyfriend.

answer: A poem that describes the feelings the narrator has about their ex.

answer: A scathing and self-deprecating break-up letter is written.

answer: The gravity of the narrator's heartbreak is conveyed through depictions of destructive natural disasters, longing for her ex-boyfriend, and a deep sensitivity to his disappearance.

text: No idea where destructive natural disasters came from.

refinement: The gravity of the narrator's heartbreak is conveyed through emotional introspection, longing for her ex-boyfriend, and a deep sensitivity to his disappearance.

answer: This is a love story relating the feelings of the narrator after a lost love.

answer: The narrator is lamenting the loss of a romantic partner


text:
I miss the wind. Its gentle caress upon your skin, the way it billows through your hair like a silken comb, encompassing and soft like a lover's embrace. It is a calming breeze, one that allows you to put things in perspective, and return to an objective point of view.

Goddamned civilization.

The wind is gone now, the pure wind at least, replaced by the stale pollution of the city's leavings, the only breeze generated by the sheer amount of movement that happens on a regular basis. Humanity is too ignorant to see the forest for the trees, aware only of their own little bubble of reality, many refusing to accept the possibility of the unknown, as it would shatter their perceptions and rattle their "perfect" world.

Alas, I find myself on a tangent yet again. This happens quite a bit. It is a good thing I am not talking to myself.

Yes, that's right. I've known you were here.

About the last ten minutes.

Because had I simply wished to stop your espionage, you would have been quite dead by now.

Even immortals can die, Mr. Randolph.

Put down the gun, it will do you absolutely no good at this range. That calibur is only effective if you put enough distance between us to allow for a clean shot. Fired point blank, it would be fairly ineffective at causing any lethal damage.

I grow tired of this conversation. Allow me to get back on track.

You are here because of your master. He wants to know about Project K16M9.

Oh, you were not included in that conversation, were you? Please, exit those pointless shadows, come sit down.

Sit.

SIT.

Very good. Now, your master and I have-

You prefer employer. How quaint. You like to believe you have a choice in your dealings with him. I shall leave you to your delusions for now.

Calm yourself, it is irrelevant at this point. Listen carefully. Your...employer...and I have been in a partnership for...well, longer than you have been here, I assure you. You see, I remember when his organization was but a fledgling group, being staked out for destruction by those who would not benefit from it. Their stock plummeted each time your employer's team grew.

Yes, I am using vague terms. Subtlety is important when you are on candid camera.

Sit down, you are too paranoid. I own this building, and the camera in my office feeds to a recorder only I know the location of. Besides, there are far worse things to worry about with me than being seen by others. I just like using metaphors.

May I continue my tale, or would you like to inject something into the story?

I thought so.

The business grew, and as it did, so shrank those too weak or too stupid to escape the power of corporate earnings. Have you ever heard of natural selection, Mr. Randolph? It states that only the strong survive, the weak and incompetent are left to die and be eaten by those stronger and smarter than they are. Interesting theory. One that worked for quite some time.

Unfortunately, there came a time when stupidity rose up in large numbers and overthrew the balance.

Soon, the weak and the ignorant had banded together within organizations, led by overzealous leaders who took advantage of their herd mentality in order to manipulate them into doing their bidding. Brilliant in its simplicity. Relate to the flock on their level, make them feel important, make them feel drawn and led by something, and their sheer numbers will blot out the sun.

Then the takeover began.

Your employer's numbers dwindled as these groups took the hatchet - quite literally - to each of his employees, one by one. They then began to burn his profits, usually at the stake. Before long, other companies were targeted who were considered salacious, or evil. Stocks plummeted as the product was recalled. Before long, they almost went out of business.

Here, you look tense by this tale. Have some warm milk, it will ease your nerves.

Ah, I see. You prefer other things. No matter, you shouldn't feel hunger for at least another hour, long enough to relay the information.

This is where I came in. Your employer turned to me, knowing my battle strategy for good business and my track record for accomplishing the impossible through my vast networking skills, requesting my expertise in the matter. His payment was to be tendered in full once I had finished the deal.

I set to work, sending several contacts into the rival companies, the flocks of ignorance, slowly using them as splinter cell agents to topple their hierarchy. At the same time, i've kept several of my own men and women within your employer's company, measuring your market trends, keeping an eye on fiscal results, and responsible for procurement and acquisition of goods. This allowed-

Interrupt me one more time, and I shall have an excuse to put up a beautiful cremation urn that would just look tacky had it not a purpose. If anyone asks, you will have been a very close cousin. May I finish now?

Stop shaking, it doesn't befit an assassin.

This allowed me to filter all data back into my hands, from which I could finally work my magic, if you'll excuse the term. Before long, my contacts held a prominent position of power in the corporation of ignorance and weakness. Product hemorrhaged out of the company, and into your employer's. The irony of that is simply delicious. Nonetheless, before long a trade network was set up, and the two had an unofficial partnership, one that is covered within the non-disclosure agreements, or pacts as we once called them.

Now, the companies are speaking of a merger, one that will allow the sheep to live normal lives and careers, and in return, sales for your employer will never take a downturn. Moreover, my contacts have also risen to power in your employer's company, as well.

The deal has been completed. Payment is now due in full.

No, not money, you fool. Why would you believe a person such as myself has any need for material things? No, the deal was a gain for information. You see, I am a very curious person. I research, gather data, keep informed on anything and everything. I am rather traveled, you understand. As such, I now have a new source of information, and a new network from which to gather said information. One that is much stealthier than a human contact, one which doesn't require sleep, and eats only when necessary. One who lives quite a bit longer.

Go back to your master. Tell him Project K16M9 is complete.

Tell him I shall now take my payment.

Congratulations, Mr. Randolph.

You both work for ME now.

title: Strictly A Business Matter

question: What is Project K16M9?

answer: Project K16M9 is complete by the speaker taking payment from Mr. Randolph's employer. The payment is that Mr. Randolph and his employer now work for the speaker.

text: The response does not explain what Project K16M9 is, instead, takes an excerpt of the conversation from the story.

refinement: The answer cannot be found in the article.

answer: The text doesn't say.

answer: Yet to be answered.

question: Who is the speaker?

text: Empty response.

refinement: The speaker's name is not given, but what is known about him is that he is a well-informed researcher, inquisitive for new information, and is rather curious about anything and everything. It appears he is also a businessman who succeeded in saving a company by employing his skills and connections to help the company recover its losses.

text: Empty response.

refinement: The speaker's name is not given, but what is known about him is that he is a well-informed researcher, inquisitive for new information, and is rather curious about anything and everything. It appears he is also a businessman who succeeded in saving a company by employing his skills and connections to help the company recover its losses.

answer: The speaker's name is not given in the text. The speaker is curious. The speaker researches, gathers data, keeps informed on anything and everything and is also well traveled. He is knowledgeable about weapons. He was responsible for saving a company by being smarter than the people working for the company. The speaker is not materialistic, does not require payment in monetary terms. The speaker is more interested in information. He likes metaphors.

text: Well-traveled should be spelled with a hyphen.

refinement: The speaker's name is not given in the text. The speaker is curious. The speaker researches, gather data, keeps informed on anything and everything, and is also well-traveled. He is knowledgeable about weapons. He was responsible for saving a company by being smarter than the people working for the company. The speaker is not materialistic and does not require payment in monetary terms. The speaker is more interested in the information. He likes metaphors.

question: Summarize all the information relating to Mr. Randoplh.

answer: Mr. Randolph was sent to spy on the speaker. He is immortal. Mr. Randolph has a gun, but the wrong gun for the application. Mr. Randolph was hiding in the shadows, he is ordered to sit down by the speaker. His employer sent him to find out about Project K16M9.

answer: Mr. Randolph is not Mr. Randolph's real name - they are acquaintances and he calls him 'Mister'. The Master wants to know about Project K16M9, not realizing Mr. Randolph has long been on video by now and has been captured by his presumed 'employer'. Mr. Randolph is an assassin, visibly edgy. He obeys every command and looks tense - Mr. Randolph seems to know things but is not in the know.

text:
The statement, "they are acquaintances, and he calls him 'Mister'" is misleading information.
"Mr. Randolph is not Mr. Randolph's real name." there is no evidence in the article to support this claim.

refinement: Mr. Randolph is a character sent by his master to gather information about Project K16M9. Unknown to him, Mr. Randolph was captured on camera by his presumed 'employer,' the narrator. Mr. Randolph is an assassin that obeys every command but is visibly edgy; he looks tense. Mr. Randolph seems to know things but doesn't know too much.

answer: He wants information about Project K16M9. It is unclear which institution Mr. Randolph works for. Mr. Randoplh is an immortal, whilst Mr. Randolph is working for the institution of ignorance. Mr. Randolph is a former vampire and the target of Mr. Randoplh.

text: It says that it is unclear which institution Mr. Randolph works, yet it later mentions that Mr. Randolph works for the institution of ignorance. The response is misleading.

refinement: Mr. Randolph wants information about Project K16M9, but it is unclear which institution Mr. Randolph works for.

text: The response mentions that Mr. Randolph is a former vampire, but there is no evidence to support that claim.

refinement: Mr. Randolph is an assassin who obeys orders.

text: Is Mr. Randolph a target of himself?

refinement: It seems Mr. Randolph is the current target of the narrator.

question: What happened to the wind?

answer: The city's pollution has made the gentle wind nearly non-existent.

answer: Pure wind is gone, it was replaced by the stale pollution of the city's leavings. A breeze is generated by the amount of movement that happens on a regular basis.

answer: The wind was replaced by pollution as civilization expanded.

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: The speaker confronts/ educates his would-be assassin about Project K16M9. The speaker orchestrated various dealings the payment for which is the services of the assassin and of the assassin's employer.

text: The sentence, "The speaker orchestrated various dealings the payment for which is the services of the assassin and of the assassin's employer," does not appear quite clear and can be rewritten.

refinement: The speaker confronts/ educates his would-be assassin about Project K16M9. The speaker orchestrated various dealings and requested his payment through the assassin's services and the assassin's employer.

answer: An unnamed narrator confronts Mr. Randolph, an assassin working for Mr. Smith. The narrator declares that he has completed the Project K16M9, a task that was requested of him by Mr. Smith, and now takes his payment.

text:
There is no mention of the name of the assassin's employer, so it's not known that the employer's name is Mr. Smith.
The statement, "...and now takes his payment," is unclear what his payment is.

refinement: An unnamed narrator confronts Mr. Randolph, an assassin and a spy working for an unnamed employer. The narrator declares that he has completed Project K16M9, a task requested by the assassin's employer, and now requests his payment.

answer: The narrator fools an assassin and uses the fact they are immortal to boss him around. The narrator has a powerful partnership with an organization lead by a shadowy boss.

text:
'lead by a shadowy boss.' is grammatically incorrect and also misleading and confusing.
The sentence, 'The narrator fools an assassin and uses the fact they are immortal to boss him around' It is not known that the narrator fools the assassin.

refinement: The narrator informed his would-be assassin about Project K16M9. Seemingly, the narrator claimed to have saved the employer's company from financial disaster on request, and upon completion, the narrator requested his payment through the assassin's services and the assassin's employer.

answer: The narrator discusses longevity and how humans are becoming too dependent on social networking and too reliant on other species. It is implied that the narrator has managed to take on the organizations of two prominent organizations (Mr.Randolph is also a bird, the narrator's organization being a speckled dog)

text: The article does not mention that the narrator discussed longevity, humans relying on other species, Mr. Randolph being a bird, or that the narrator's organization is a speckled dog.

refinement: The narrator informed his would-be assassin about Project K16M9. Seemingly, the narrator claimed to have saved the employer's company from financial disaster on request, and upon completion, the narrator requested his payment through the assassin's services and the assassin's employer.

answer: A man has found the hidden spy lurking in the shadows. He talks about how he is not included in a conversation about Project K16M9 and then confronts the spy about the deal his organization had with his employer.

answer: A business man and his employee are being shot by someone, it seems, and the former tells the latter his manager is looking to find out more about Project K16M9 and how the author has been traveling, then asks Randolph if his boss told him anything. Randolph then lean to be "taken to the castle" and to go and tell his boss the author will no longer work for him and that there contract is now over; he prods the two to quit working for him, which they meekly comply with without resisting.

text:
The article does not mention a businessman and his employee being shot by someone.
The sentence, 'Randolph then lean to be "taken to the castle" and to go and tell his boss the author will no longer work for him and that their contract is now over; he prods the two to quit working for him, which they meekly comply with without resisting.' is inaccurate, not part of the input, and misleading.
The summary does not mention who Mr. Randolph is and the business the narrator did for him. It also omits the Project K16M9 Mr. Randolph was sent for.

refinement: The narrator informed his would-be assassin about Project K16M9. Seemingly, the narrator claimed to have saved the employer's company from financial disaster on request, and upon completion, the narrator requested his payment through the assassin's services and the assassin's employer.


text:
AFTER SEEING HOW A SODA CAN TAPED TO THE STEERING WHEEL TRANSFORMS THE MERCEDES S-CLASS INTO AN AUTONOMOUS VEHICLE, THE OWNER OF THIS INFINITI MUST HAVE THOUGHT TO HIMSELF: _"HOLD ON, MY CAR IS JUST AS TECHNOLOGICALLY ADVANCED AS ANYTHING THE GERMANS MAKE. WHY DON'T I TRY THAT AS WELL?"_

And he did, with quite amazing results. This Austrian fellow discovered he doesn't even need to stick a can of soda to the steering wheel to simulate a driver's hand. The Infiniti is fine with taking care of the steering for you, even in the relatively unsafe circumstance where you've completely let go of the controls.

After that, the driver decided to take things even further by becoming a passenger. And what do you know? The Q50 isn't even phased by not feeling the weight of the driver on the seat. It simply continues gliding down the highway at some speed. Tchaikovsky's _Dance of the Sugar Plum Fairy_ (has been changed to Ride of the Valkyries by Wagner) and the fact that the car is going down the highway at 100 km/h really made out hair stand on end.

The Infiniti driverless stunt is sure to give people lots of crazy ideas. Who's to say you can't get into the car drunk, jump into the passenger seat and let the car cruise down the highway until you're home. And if the police do catch you, the case will probably take years to settle. And what happens if you jump out the window like that guy in the i3 did? It will probably keep driving until it runs out of fuel, won't it? That's why we feel these assist systems that do everything for you aren't the most thought-out idea ever.

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question: What country is the man from?

answer: Based on the mention of Austria, the man is likely from Austria.

answer: Austria.

answer: Austria

answer: Austria.

question: Who wrote the Dance of the Sugar Plum Fairy?

answer: Tchaikovsky

answer: Tchaikovsky.

answer: Tchaikovsky wrote the Dance of the Sugar Plum Fairy.

answer: Tchaikovsky

question: What was stuck to a steering wheel to make a Mercedes autonomous?

answer: A can of soda.

answer: A soda can.

answer: A soda can.

answer: A can of soda

question: What car originally was made driverless?

answer: The Mercedes S-Class.

answer: The Infiniti

text: "The Infiniti" - is inaccurate. The car is a Mercedes S-Class

answer: A Mercedes.

text: "A Mercedes." - add "S-Class" because simply using "Mercedes" is too general.

answer: The Infiniti Q50.

text: "The Infiniti Q50" - is inaccurate. The car is a Mercedes S-Class

question: Write a ~1 sentence summary.

answer: The driver of an Infiniti Q50 decided to let the car drive itself and discovered that the car was able to drive itself even without the driver on the seat.

text: "without the driver on the seat." - revise for clarity: "without him in the driver's seat."

refinement: The driver of an Infiniti Q50 decided to let the car drive itself and discovered that the car was able to drive itself even without him in the driver's seat.

answer: The author describes a man who discovered that his car can drive itself and decides to become a passenger.

text: "The author describes a man who discovered that his car can drive itself and decides to become a passenger." - Add the details about the car.

refinement: The author describes a man who discovered that his car, an Infiniti Q50, can drive itself and decides to become a passenger.

answer: The driver of an Infiniti Q50 decided to let the car drive itself, and found that it was able to do so without any problems. This could lead to some dangerous situations, however.

text: Went over the 1-sentence summary requirement. Delete "This could lead to some dangerous situations, however."

refinement: The driver of an Infiniti Q50 decided to let the car drive itself and found that it was able to do so without any problems.

text: "car drive itself," - delete the comma

refinement: The driver of an Infiniti Q50 decided to let the car drive itself, and found that it was able to do so without any problems.

answer: The article summarizes how a man made his car self-driving by hooking a soda can to the steering wheel.

text: "The article summarizes how a man made his car self-driving by hooking a soda can to the steering wheel." - this only part of the story. The real summary should be about the Infiniti Q50 owner who saw the video. A complete rewrite is needed.

refinement: The article is about a man who decides to test his Infiniti Q50's self-driving capabilities after watching a video about a Mercedes S-Class driving itself with only a soda can taped to the steering wheel.


text:
I can still hear my dad getting ready to go out as I lay in bed. I know he will be coming by our room any minute to check on me. It’s almost a nightly ritual. My brother and I had been in bed for about an hour. He is fast asleep. I can’t sleep because I know what is going to happen. I hear my dad’s footsteps coming towards our room. The door creaks open. He whispers, “Dougie? Are you awake?” I never answer the first time. He asks again. This time I respond, “Yeah dad?” He replies, “Ummm…I have to run up to the Package Store for some cigarettes. I’ll be back in a few minutes. You need to get to sleep.” I say, “OK, you’ll come right back, dad?” He assures me he will and leaves. I know he’s not coming right back.
I get up and make sure my brother is covered up and asleep. I leave my room and see what time it is. It’s only 9:30 PM. I look around for a snack and then go turn on the television. I flip the dial around. There’s nothing on. I see headlights coming through the window. For a brief second, I think maybe he did come right back. Then the lights continue up the road and the hope is lost. I know it will be another long night of arguing and fighting and me not sleeping. I go back and lay in the darkness. Hoping my dad is alright and that he gets home before my mom does at 2:30 AM. They have been fighting a lot lately and they keep talking about divorce. I think about that for awhile. I’m not exactly sure what it is. It sounds terrible. I doze off for a bit. Then the phone rings. It’s loud and piercing. I know it’s my mom. I can’t answer it because then I would be telling on my dad. However, when no one answers, she’s knows he’s not there anyway. I would love to pick it up and tell her we’re fine and not to worry about dad being gone. After all, he said he was coming right back. That was two hours ago.
Awhile later, the phone rings again. It seems even louder this time. I pull the covers and pillow over my head to quiet the noise. Then I get up and start looking out the window. Praying that every set of headlights I see is my dad. I watch and I watch. The lights are never his. It’s getting late now; almost 2:00 AM. I start getting really anxious. I don’t want to hear the fighting. I walk around the dark house aimlessly, enjoying the silence. I figure I’d better get to bed. Mom will be home soon. I don’t want her to think I’ve been up this whole time. That will make it worse.
I hear mom’s car pull in. She slams the door because dad’s truck is gone. I hear her pick up the phone and call my grandparents. She asks if they have heard from my dad. Of course they have not. She starts crying. She is doing her best. I hear my dad’s truck pull in. He comes through the front door. I can only imagine what kind of shape he is in. My mom yells something at him. He slurs something back, but his drunkenness will not allow the words to make sense. She calls him a no good, alcoholic bum. He slams something down and breaks it. I grab pillows and stuffed animals and try to shut out the noise. It doesn’t help. I just hope my baby brother doesn’t wake up. They eventually go outside, but I can still hear them. I can hear my dad punching the house. I get up and peek out to make sure he’s not hitting my mom. They come back in and my dad finally passes out on the couch.
My mom washes her face and gets into bed. I try and sleep, but I can hear her crying. I feel like comforting her. I don’t know how. I’m only ten years old. I have to try and sleep now, but it’s hard because I know it will probably happen again tonight.

title: [NF] Come Right Back

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about the narrator's parent's relationship?

answer: The narrator describes a dysfunctional relationship between the parents in the story. The parents fight often and the dad regularly disappears without telling the kids where he has gone. The mother becomes extremely worried and upset when the dad returns and the son stays up through the night listening to the fights. The parents seem to put more energy into fighting and drinking than into parenting.

text: This is inaccurate and the dad doesn't disappear without telling the kids. The dad always checks on Dougie and his brother every time he sneaks out to drink, it has become a nightly ritual.

refinement: The narrator describes a dysfunctional relationship between the parents in the story. The parents fight often becasue the dad regularly sneaks out to go drinking. The mother becomes extremely worried and upset when the dad returns and the son stays up through the night listening to the fights. The parents seem to put more energy into fighting and drinking than into parenting.

text: This part of the response is judgmental and should be deleted. Also, the mom tries her best and the dad is the one who is always drinking.

refinement: The narrator describes a dysfunctional relationship between the parents in the story. The parents fight often because the dad regularly sneaks out to go drinking. The mother becomes extremely worried and upset when the dad returns and the son stays up through the night listening to the fights.

text: Missing the part about the parents talking about divorce because the dad is an alcoholic bum. Needs a revision.

refinement: The relationship between Dougie's (the narrator) parents is deteriorating to the point of divorce due to his dad's drinking problem. His parents fight often because his dad regularly sneaks out to go drinking and leaves Dougie and his younger brother at home alone. The mother becomes extremely worried and upset when the dad returns and the son stays up through the night listening to the fights.

answer: The narrator's parents keeps fighting each other. The narrator's dad is always drunk, which makes their parents' fights worse. The crying of the narrator's mom can be heard. Both parties continue arguing, mentioned that they're talking about divorce. The narrator already notices the misconduct in the house when she was only 10 years old. She is actually worried about her parents fighting again, but when her dad finally came back home, their mom still lambasted him for going somewhere without telling her.

text: Dougie is a boy, not a girl.

refinement: The narrator's parents keeps fighting each other. The narrator's dad is always drunk, which makes their parents' fights worse. The crying of the narrator's mom can be heard. Both parties continue arguing, mentioned that they're talking about divorce. The narrator already notices the misconduct in the house when he was only 10 years old. He is actually worried about his parents fighting again, but when his dad finally came back home, his mom still lambasted him for going somewhere without telling her.

text: Change the verb.

refinement: The narrator's parents keep fighting each other. The narrator's dad is always drunk, which makes their parents' fights worse. The crying of the narrator's mom can be heard. Both parties continue arguing, mentioned that they're talking about divorce. The narrator already notices the misconduct in the house when he was only 10 years old. He is actually worried about his parents fighting again, but when his dad finally came back home, his mom still lambasted him for going somewhere without telling her.

text: Extraneous information that can be removed.

refinement: The narrator's parents keep fighting each other. The narrator's dad is always drunk, which makes their parents' fights worse. Both parties continue arguing, mentioned that they're talking about divorce. He is actually worried about his parents fighting again, but when his dad finally came back home, his mom still lambasted him for going somewhere without telling her.

text: This section of the response is an issue because there is no lead-up to why the dad finally came back home. Also, the mom didn't lambast the dad for going out and not telling her. She gave him an earful because he left their kids alone at home to go on a bender again.

refinement: The narrator's parents keep fighting each other. The narrator's dad is always drunk, which makes their parents' fights worse. Both parties continue arguing, mentioned that they're talking about divorce. They are always fighting because Dougie's dad is a no-good, alcoholic bum who sneaks out every night to go drinking. Every time his dad goes on a bender, he leaves Dougie, who's only 10 years old, and his baby brother alone in the house and tries to get home before his mom does, but he always comes home late and drunk.

answer: The story portrays a relationship between parents that is strained and tumultuous. The father leaves without telling the narrator where he is going, which causes the narrator anxiety. The parents argue and fight constantly, sometimes violently. Eventually, the father comes back drunk, which interrupts the household and causes the mother to cry. Ultimately, the narrator is upset and worried about their family in the midst of all of the turmoil.

text: Extraneous information.

refinement: The story portrays a relationship between parents that is strained and tumultuous. The parents argue and fight constantly, sometimes violently.

text: Add that the parents are talking about divorce.

refinement: The story portrays a relationship between parents that is strained and tumultuous. The parents argue and fight constantly, sometimes violently, and keep talking about divorce.

answer: The narrator's parents had been arguing a lot lately. They keep talking about divorce. They bicker and fight a lot. The narrator's dad has been out drinking and never comes back on time.

answer: The narrator's father is described as an alcoholic bum by his mother. It appears to be routine for the father to leave the kids at home alone while the mother is out late. This causes them to get into verbal abuse fights every time. The parents have been fighting a lot and talking about divorce which has been giving the narrator anxiety. The narrator knows it will probably happen again the next night.

text: Extraneous information that can be removed.

refinement: The narrator's father is described as an alcoholic bum by his mother. It appears to be routine for the father to leave the kids at home alone while the mother is out late. The parents have been fighting a lot and talking about divorce which has been giving the narrator anxiety.


text:
NASA’s Curiosity rover has sent back a pair of very curious photos since March that have resurfaced in conspiracy circles as evidence of a “genuine spaceship” and “thigh bones” visible on Mars.

Alien hunters and UFO enthusiasts are celebrating after two photos appear to show distinct signs of life on Mars. The first photo causing jaws to drop in the reddit conspiracy theorist group Martian Archaeology shows what appears to be fossilized bones or petrified wood protruding from the red planet’s surface. The photo dates back to 2014 and NASA responded to the online uproar then by acknowledging -- but dismissing -- that the "alien thigh bone" could be linked to extraterrestrial life. The debris pile from the Curiosity’s photograph already has convinced some wishful-thinking alien enthusiasts of extraterrestrial activity on Mars.

 [nasa bones] NASA's Mars Curiosity Rover found bones? Photo: NASA

"After years of research and study, I'm convinced now, more than ever, that there is much more to Mars than what NASA admits to," a reddit user named TJ Devereaux remarked. “I'm certain life, including water, and intelligent life forms, once occupied the planet, and ... big leap here ... that both still exist, in much smaller quantities."

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Images of the same bone-like object taken 10 days apart show it had grown larger, causing many to speculate it could be a fungus formed on the supposed "alien bone."

The second image from NASA’s robotic Opportunity rover, also known as MER-B or MER-1, appears to show a shiny, metallic object on Mars’ surface that provoked speculation that it is an alien spacecraft. But several commenters in reddit’s “UFO” forum point out that, like most NASA images from the Curiosity and Opportunity, it’s difficult to gauge the actual size or details from the grainy photo.

 [Mars Curiosity] Mars Curiosity finds "spaceship?" Photo: NASA

Curiosity Rover's Findings After Five Years On Mars:

NASA’s Curiosity rover landed in Mars’ Gale Crater on Aug. 5, 2012, using a complex and never-before-attempted maneuver involving a giant parachute, a jet-controlled descent vehicle and a bungee-like apparatus labeled a “sky crane.” NASA says Curiosity's mission is “to determine whether the Red Planet ever was, or is, habitable to microbial life.” The rover, which is about the size of a Mini Cooper, is equipped with 17 cameras and a robotic arm that features several specialized laboratory-like tools and instruments to analyze objects on Mars’ surface.

The Curiosity mission has produced more than 4,700 usable images from Mars’ surface, including 26 new images posted Wednesday. An ancient Martian lake and other indications of Earth-like microbes are among the findings revealed by the rover.

But not everyone is convinced the photos show definitive signs of life on Mars.

“The object certainly appears to be artificial. We know that the rover was taking pictures of its own entry debris at that time. There's nothing particularly alien about the object in question — it could easily be entry debris,” Reddit user “Once Returned” suggested.

Others noted that regardless of the shiny object’s significance, it could be labeled an “Unidentified Landed Object.”

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“One explanation is that the object is a piece of debris from the Mars rover itself or from its sky crane landing system,” Nigel Watson, author of "The UFO Investigations Manual," told the Daily Mail. “Unless we get more detailed information this is another case of wishful thinking.”

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Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What is depicted in the photos sent back by the Curiosity rover?

answer: The first photo shows what appear to be fossilized bones or petrified wood on Mars. The second photo shows a shiny, metallic object on Mars' surface.

answer: It is suspected that the object that was photographed is a spaceship and alien bones.

answer: The front image seems to depict a fossilized bone or petrified wood. The back image contains what can be interpreted as a metallic UFO.

answer: The photos show what appears to be a bone-like object protruding from the red planet's surface and an unidentified shiny object on Mars' surface.

answer: The photos depict a purported "alien thigh bone" and what appears to be a metallic object on Mars.

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When was this article published?

answer: The article was published in July 2018.

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answer: March 2017

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What is the implication of the photos?

answer: The two photos indicate the possibility of life on Mars. Some alien enthusiasts believe that these photos indicate the existence of an alien spacecraft or bones of extraterrestrial past life forms.

answer: The implication of the photos is that the bones and metal object in the photos may indicate extraterrestrial life on Mars.

answer: The bone is an alien thigh bone, and the metal ground is evidence of an alien spaceship.

answer: The first photos seem to suggest the possibility of alien life on Mars.

answer: The pictures of bones and a "alien thigh bone" and the photos of what could be a spaceship are being celebrated as evidence of the existence of Alien life on Mars.

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What are some alternate explanations for the contents of the photos?

answer: One explanation for the shapes seen in the images is that they are simply pieces of debris from the Mars rover or its sky crane landing system. Another possibility is that the objects are simply an artifact of the imaging process, such as defects or shadows, and are not indicative of extraterrestrial activity.

answer: The two photos taken by the NASA rover's pictures show something that is supposed to be evidence of life. However, other possible explanations for the grainy photos include one that states that the so-called bone looked like the Rover's own entry debris, and another that states it's just another piece of space junk.

answer: The argument can be made that parts of the photos were the camera used to take the pictures and its test cartridges.

answer: It is possible that the objects in the photos could be residue from the Mars Curiosity or its descent system. Another possible explanation is that the objects are just random debris on the planet's surface.

answer: The photos could be the rover's own entry debris.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: "NASA'S Curiosity rover took photos of a "chunk of debris" in Gale Crater on Mars that caused it to look like a spiderweb. Many people thought that the spiderweb is a result of probability. The alleged UFO is a fabrication of NASA's rover landing system that fell to the surface. They expose odd irregularities in the picture to make it look like something outside of the rover's building system rather than the Rover itself."

answer: Two photos from NASA's Curiosity rover, which landed on Mars in 2012, have provoked speculation that they depict "alien bones" and a possible spacecraft. However, no hard evidence has been presented, and skeptics doubt that the objects are evidence of extraterrestrial life.

answer: NASA's Curiosity rover has recently sent back a photo that has shaken the conspiracy community. Within the picture, what appears to be bones or even petrified wood one of most likely, alien interference can be seen. A lot of feedback emerged about the happenings of this "genuine spaceship". NASA removed bones in a statement regarding the Martian tripod fantasy.

answer: Two NASA photos from Mars have sparked speculation that may indicate life or a spaceship on the surface of the red planet. The first photo showed what appears to be fossilized bones or petrified wood protruding from the surface, but NASA insists that they are likely just debris from the Martian environment. The second photo shows what appears to be a shiny metal object, but further investigation shows it could be just part of the rover's own debris. Regardless, there is still no definitive evidence of life on Mars.

answer: The article concerns a pair of photos sent back by the Mars Rover. The first photo depicts what looks like a fossilized bone, and the second depicts a shiny metal object that looks like it could have belonged to an alien spacecraft. Commenters on Reddit speculate that these photos could be signs of alien life on Mars. Another possibility is that the metal object is entry debris from the rover itself.