text:
    Frank stepped out of his car and closed the door behind him.  He locked it as he walked away and didn't look to check, the clunk was enough.  The key to the front door of his terraced house went into the lock first time, without him stabbing at it. He buzzed a little fanfare with his lips and smiled - on the inside.  It was a minor success and he’ll take it.
          Once inside, he took off his coat, hung it up behind the vestibule door and took a sharp breath. The scent damp and familiar but welcoming. He eased off his shoes and socks and walked across the carpet in the dining room to get to the kitchen where he’d left his slippers. The carpet was less than a week old and felt pleasant underfoot.  He knew it wouldn't last and it irked him.
    He put the kettle on and thought about his last ever day at work.  He didn’t particularly like his job but he didn’t hate it, either.  He was just glad it was all over.  His last day finished over at the Black Horse and only drew a few of Frank's colleagues.  He enjoyed the four pints they bought for him and he was grateful but he had to be home before his phone rang.
    Frank’s only son lives in Australia.  He was looking forward to the perfunctory phone call he receives every year on his birthday, at the express wishes of his wife.  She only insists on this because she wants a new car when he eventually dies.  They can have it but there won’t be much change afterwards.  He really didn’t care for the money, anyway.
    The call came and went and was shorter than even he expected.  He made excuses for him in his own mind, saying he was busy and that he had an important job that always required his attention.  He hoped for grandchildren and that it might bring his son home.  He was doubtful, though.  His son was as stubborn as he.  A real chip off the ol’ block, you might say.  He might speak to him later in the year but, then again, he might not.
    He finished the last of his still warm cup of tea, walked into to the hallway, put the latch on the front door and proceeded to climb the stairs.  He’d take the phone off the hook as he went past it but he knew it wasn’t going to ring.  He wasn’t out of breath as he reached the top but his joints ached and it seemed an extra stair is added everytime he had to make his way to the summit.
    He entered the back bedroom, drew the curtains, switched on the light and closed the door behind him.  He slowly lowered himself to his knees, which was no trivial feat and let out an involuntary groan until he was down.  He shuffled a short distance to the front of his wardrobe and drew out a case from underneath it.  The case was bound with worn leather and had two latches that could lock but never were.  His thumbs released the latches with a satisfying snap and then proceeded to open it with one swift movement to completion.
    He gazed at its contents for a moment, the artificial light reflected back at him.  He pushed his glasses back onto the bridge of his nose, sniffed lightly and placed his hands on the cool metal of his trumpet.  With one hand on the handle of the wardrobe and the trumpet in the other, he stood.  There was a regular crack from each knee and a reply to the groan he made on his descent.  He settled himself on his feet for a minute or so and then pointed the trumpet towards the drawn curtains of the window.
    He drew in his breath and placed the mouthpiece lightly against his moist lips.  He released the air slowly and for half a second there was no sound other than the hiss of his breath, transferring its warmth to the body of the instrument, followed by a burst of sound that bounced back at him from the hard walls of the room.  He did this again and again, running a few scales until the instrument felt warm.  He was careful not tire himself out and held the trumpet with both hands close to his chest after clearing any spit from inside.
    Satisfied, he again raised the trumpet to his lips, closed his eyes and blew.  He began the only piece he knew from start to finish and as his lungs swelled, so did his heart.  Colour, vivid but warm, filled the room from the bottom up.  It warmed his face and body to a glow.  His tongue, precise and definite, his fingers light and nimble.  With each crescendo his feet hovering an inch from the carpet only to be lowered, gently, six inches into it, snug and reassuring.  His ears confirmed pitch perfection, whilst the tone and timing like no other.  Now in full flow, his body emitted the most loving ache - it consumed him.  Bar after bar, a relentless flow.
    Finally, as he neared the end and before his breath and his stamina failed him, he played the finishing notes.  The sound seemed to linger, in his imagination at least and predictably, the colours drained from the walls, albeit with less haste than they had come.  He gave the trumpet a wipe with a cloth from the case, removing any fingerprints and oiled the valves.  He returned the trumpet to its case, closed the latches without locking them and slid it back into the space under the wardrobe, now free from sight.
    His soul, like stoked embers, remained and radiated into the walls, giving them a fleeting hue as he mirrored his journey back to the kitchen.  He filled the kettle and switched it on.  If only there was another to share it with but the thought never occurred to him.  It occurred to me, though, but who am I to say?

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This is my first attempt at writing fiction.  Any constructive feedback is welcome.  Thanks.

title: [MF] Frank's Trumpet and Oh, How He Needs It.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about Frank's daily life?

answer: Frank is retired from his job and lives alone. He is looking forward to a phone call from his son, who lives in Australia. Frank plays his trumpet every day.

text: The phone call is on his birthday.

refinement: Frank is retired from his job and lives alone. He is looking forward to a phone call from his son on his birthday, who lives in Australia. Frank plays his trumpet every day.

text: It does not say he plays it every day, but he must play it often

refinement: Frank is retired from his job and lives alone. He is looking forward to a phone call from his son on his birthday, who lives in Australia. Frank plays his trumpet often to make up for the lack of company.

answer: No answer

text: An attempt to summarize should include his loneliness and retirement

refinement: Frank is retired from his job and lives alone. He is looking forward to a phone call from his son on his birthday, who lives in Australia. Frank plays his trumpet often to make up for the lack of company.

answer: Frank lives a quiet, solitary life. He has a son who lives in Australia and a wife who is always pressuring him to buy her a new car. Frank's job is a source of income, but he doesn't like it. He enjoys the occasional pint with his colleagues, but they don't get together often. Frank's life is quiet and solitary. He enjoys playing his trumpet.

text: Frank is retired

refinement: Frank lives a quiet, solitary life. He has a son who lives in Australia and a wife who is always pressuring him to buy her a new car. Frank is retired, and only four colleagues came to see him off when he left. Frank's life is quiet and solitary. He enjoys playing his trumpet.

text: This is stated twice

refinement: Frank lives a quiet, solitary life. He has a son who lives in Australia and a wife who is always pressuring him to buy her a new car. Frank is retired, and only four colleagues came to see him off when he left. He enjoys playing his trumpet.

text: His son's wife is trying to get his car when he dies.

refinement: Frank lives a quiet, solitary life. He has a son who lives in Australia who never calls him. Frank is retired, and only four colleagues came to see him off when he left. He enjoys playing his trumpet.

answer: Frank's daily life consisted of a routine: he would get up, get ready for work, go to work, and return home. He would play his trumpet, have a cup of tea, and go to bed.

text: Frank is retired.

refinement: Frank is retired and his life is quiet and solitary. He would play his trumpet, have a cup of tea, and go to bed.

text: He has a son who only calls him once a year on his birthday.

refinement: Frank is retired and his life is quiet and solitary. He would play his trumpet, have a cup of tea, and go to bed. He has a son who only calls him once a year on his birthday. Other than that he is alone.

answer: Frank lives a quiet, solitary life. He has a son who lives in Australia and a wife who is always pressuring him to buy her a new car. Frank's job is a source of income, but he doesn't like it. He enjoys the occasional pint with his colleagues, but they don't get together often. Frank's life is quiet and solitary.

answer: No answer

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about how to clean a trumpet?

answer: No answer

text: He carefully wipes the trumpet to remove any fingerprints and oils valves.

refinement: He carefully wipes the trumpet to remove any fingerprints and oils valves.

answer: Frank carefully wipes the piston rods and valves.

text: He carefully wipes the trumpet to remove any fingerprints and oils valves.

refinement: He carefully wipes the trumpet to remove any fingerprints and oils valves.

answer: No answer

text: He carefully wipes the trumpet to remove any fingerprints and oils valves.

refinement: He carefully wipes the trumpet to remove any fingerprints and oils valves.

answer: No answer

text: He carefully wipes the trumpet to remove any fingerprints and oils valves.

refinement: He carefully wipes the trumpet to remove any fingerprints and oils valves.


split: train

text:
Kraine only needed to focus on three things. First, and most importantly, getting to the golden orb. That would declare him victorious, and one of the living. Secondly, his opponent, Culp. She had been in the mazes for many years, and was considered a pro. She knew how to maneuver the courses, and all the tricks to making sure that the other player was dead. Lastly, and probably the most unpredictable aspect of the maze, Kraine needed to watch out for Ghol. Ghol was the shadow seeker that had been added to the games a few years ago. Ghol would change the environment of the mazes. From dark and stormy, to even changing the ground to lava. To be successful, and survive with his life, Kraine needed to always be thinking.
	Kraine waited at the gate, listening for the bell to signal the start of the game. With deep breaths, he remembered what the officials had told him about the layout of the maze.
	“This is a square maze, One cubic kilometer. The orb will be placed in the center, and you both will start on the south side gates. Any attempt to communicate outside the viewing dome will result in automatic death.”
	The sound of the bell shook Kraine’s ears, and the crowd erupted in a massive cheer. He stepped on to the maze, and noticed the floor was covered in grass, and the normally gray walls had been replaced by large rocks and mossy trees. To his left were the weapons. There was everything from handguns, to wooden staffs. Kraine selected a spear and throwing knifes. To his right, he watched Culp dash away around a tree, leaving everything on the table, but the landmines. There was one smoke stick on the ground that culp had dropped. Kraine stowed it in his satchel and started to run in the opposite direction Culp had.
	A half hour went by, as Kraine ran circles around the maze, checking every corner for Culp. There was still no sign on Ghol, but Kraine knew he would show up eventually. After slowing down to catch his breath, Kraine looked up to the top of the dome encasing the maze, and found a golden beam of light shooting straight down from the highest point of the glass prison. He knew that is where the orb would be.
	Kraine decided to get to be able to see past the trees and rocks so he could plan a route, and searched for a break in the boulders to climb up on. There was a ledge large enough to allow him to grab a branch. Hoisting himself up, he quickly spotted Culp. He went straight for his knives. Holding his breath, Kraine took aim at a tree behind Culp; far enough away that he knew she would have to walk over and investigate. The knife zipped through the air and landed in the tree with a solid thud. He swiftly sunk down so Culp couldn’t find where the knife had come from. He waited to hear the rustling of Culps robe before he peeked his head up from behind the tree branch. His plan had worked! Kraine bounded over the rocks and sprinted for cover. Culp heard him and she turned sharply, like a startled cat.
	Kraine panicked and tried to think how to hide himself. He remembered the smoke stick he picked up at the weapons display. In one smooth motion, Kraine grabbed the smoke stick by the ignition string and tossed it in front of him. The stick flew forward, jerked, and pulled itself off the ignition string. The entire maze dome instantly became shrouded with a haze, thick and heavy.  Light marking the location from the orb had been smothered completely.  Waiting a few seconds to make sure Culp had lost track of him, Kraine started a low sprint. Keeping his feet low to the ground, he tried to keep as silent as possible.
	Out of the smoke a large tree appeared in front of Kraine, and seemed to rush up and smack his whole body, hitting the ground back first. Recovering from his fall, the ground turned to ice and the tree started to circle around him like he was a sacrificial offering. The landscape was changing, and Kraine knew why.
“Ghol!” Kraine shouted. “I am not afraid of you! I’m going to get that orb! Don’t waste your time with me! You won’t be able to stop me!” Fists clenched and chest raised, Kraine held his ground, watching the tree circle around him.
Out of nowhere, and ear piercing bang too Kraine by surprise. Bits of bark and leaves flew past his face. The tree had hit one of Culp’s landmines. Kraine knew that he was probably surrounded by landmines by now. Afraid to take even one step, Kraine needed to think of how he could maneuver in the smoke, without being blown to pieces. He thought of using his spear as a sort of walking stick, but ruled it out. He might need it for protection later. Then Kraine went to his throwing knives. He had used on to distract Culp, which left him nineteen. He hoped this would be enough to get him to the orb.
Not moving his feet, Kraine crouched low to the ice, took out one knife, and sent it sliding a few meters in front of him. Just as the knife sounded like it was coming to a stop, the same ear piercing bang sent flying chunks of ice all around, leaving a small crater where the mine had been. Again and again, the knifes became flying shrapnel as the mines exploded.
By now, the smoke had thinned and had settled as a light fog. Kraine searched frantically for the golden light the marked where the orb would be. He needed to know which direction to send his last knife. He was afraid that he had gone the wrong direction.
Out of despair, Kraine leaned his head back and exhaled. There was a small shine above him. Kraine tilted his head to the side, confused, and had an epiphany. He was right in the beam of light! He looked left and right, then at the ground. The orb was underneath him, encased by the ice. Quickly, he started to chipped away at the ground with his last knife.
This was it, Kraine would survive the maze! His heart began to race as he heard Culp speak behind him.
“Good job, rookie. No one’s ever done this well against me. Too bad I’ll have to kill you now.” Ending in a soft voice, Culp slammed her foot into Kraine’s side, knocking him over.  She crouched over Kraine and punched his face until it started to bleed. She took his spear and made the last few chips at the ice.
With a thundering roar, Kraine jumped towards Culp. With his last knife in hand, he aimed for Culp’s temple. Culp fell on to her back and stuck the spear into the air. The two blades made contact to their victims at the same time. The knife into Culp’s temple the spear through Kraine’s chest.
They both died instantly. Their bodies laid limp. Kraine skewered over Culp’s bloodied body. Their hands fell together, both grasping the orb. Together they had fought, died, and lost the game.

title: The Art of Losing

question: Who are the major characters of the story?

answer: The major characters of the story are Kraine and Culp.

answer: Kraine, Culp, and Ghol.

text: I wouldn't count Ghol as a major character

answer: The major characters of the story are Kraine and Culp.

answer: Kraine, Culp, and Ghol

text: I wouldn't count Ghol as a major character

question: Why does Kraine slide his throwing knives on the ice toward the mines despite the risk of shrapnel?

answer: He's desperate to find the orb.

answer: Kraine slides his throwing knives on the ice toward the mines in order to create a path to the orb, despite the risk of being injured by the mines' explosions. He knows that he will need to use his knives as a sort of walking stick in order to maneuver in the smoke, and that he may need them for protection later.

text: He considers using his spear as a walking stick, not the knives, but he doesn't

refinement: Kraine slides his throwing knives on the ice toward the mines in order to create a path to the orb, despite the risk of being injured by the mines' explosions.

answer: He's surrounded by smoke and needs to move. He doesn't want to step on a mine and become shrapnel.

text: He's surrounded by both smoke and mines and wants to clear a path to the orb

refinement: He's surrounded by smoke and mines and needs to move to find the orb. He doesn't want to step on a mine and become shrapnel.

answer: Kraine slides his throwing knives on the ice toward the mines because he knows that the mines will explode and create a crater.

text: His goal is not to make a crater, but to get to the orb

refinement: Kraine slides his throwing knives on the ice toward the mines because he knows that the mines will explode and clear a path to the orb.

question: What happens to Ghol after he transforms the ground to ice and sends a tree to attack Kraine?

answer: We don't know, he's not mentioned in the story after that attack.

answer: Ghol is killed by Culp.

text: Ghol is not even mentioned after the attack

text: Provide a response

refinement: He is not mentioned again after the attack

answer: He is killed by Culp.

text: Ghol is not even mentioned after the attack

text: Provide a response

refinement: Ghol is not mentioned again in the story

answer: Ghol's attack on Kraine is unsuccessful, as Kraine is able to avoid the tree and landmines, and eventually kills Culp. Ghol is not able to stop Kraine from reaching the golden orb.

text: The question asks what happens to Ghol

text: Provide a response

refinement: Ghol is not mentioned again in the story

question: Why doesn't Culp finish off Kraine before going for the orb?

answer: Culp is surprised that Kraine is able to get to the orb before her.

text: Culp expresses surprise before beating Kraine up

text: Provide a response

refinement: The input does not answer this, but we might infer that she was just eager to get the orb

answer: She wants to kill him in the same way he killed her.

text: Kraine did not kill Culp prior to this

text: Provide a response

refinement: The input does not answer this, but we might infer that she was just eager to get the orb

answer: Despite her alleged experience, she makes a tactical mistake and goes for the orb while Kraine is still alive. Her reasons aren't mentioned, but she dies for her mistake.

answer: Culp is confident that she will be able to kill Kraine before he can reach the orb, but she underestimates his determination and skill. She underestimates the lengths he is willing to go to in order to win, and is caught off guard when he attacks her.

text: Culp doesn't try to kill Kraine, which is what the question is asking about

text: Provide a response

refinement: The input does not answer this, but we might infer that she was just eager to get the orb

question: Write a ~5 sentence summary.

answer: Kraine is a young man who is about to compete in a game of life and death. He is in a maze with his opponent, Culp, and must find the golden orb in order to win. Kraine must also watch out for Ghol, a shadow seeker who will change the environment of the maze. Kraine is able to find the orb, but Culp kills him and takes the orb.

text: Kraine and Culp both reach the orb and kill each other as they do

refinement: Kraine is a young man who is about to compete in a game of life and death. He is in a maze with his opponent, Culp, and must find the golden orb in order to win. Kraine must also watch out for Ghol, a shadow seeker who will change the environment of the maze. Kraine and Culp both reach the orb, but kill each other as they do.

answer: Kraine needs to reach a golden orb set in the center of a maze before his opponents. Culp is a veteran of the game, and Ghol has the ability to drastically change the environment. Some way in, the ground turns to ice, and a large tree attacks Kraine; he also discovers he's surrounded by Culp's mines. He explodes them with his throwing knives before realizing he's on top of the orb and starts to dig. However, Culp reaches him and the two manage to kill each other while grasping the orb and die.

text: The tree doesn't really "attack" Kraine, just circles him

refinement: Kraine needs to reach a golden orb set in the center of a maze before his opponents. Culp is a veteran of the game, and Ghol has the ability to drastically change the environment. Some way in, the ground turns to ice, and a large tree circles Kraine; he also discovers he's surrounded by Culp's mines. He explodes them with his throwing knives before realizing he's on top of the orb and starts to dig. However, Culp reaches him and the two manage to kill each other while grasping the orb and die.

text: "And die" is not necessary

refinement: Kraine needs to reach a golden orb set in the center of a maze before his opponents. Culp is a veteran of the game, and Ghol has the ability to drastically change the environment. Some way in, the ground turns to ice, and a large tree circles Kraine; he also discovers he's surrounded by Culp's mines. He explodes them with his throwing knives before realizing he's on top of the orb and starts to dig. However, Culp reaches him and the two manage to kill each other while grasping the orb.

answer: In this story, the protagonist, Kraine, is competing in a deadly maze game. He must fight his opponent, Culp, and avoid the shadowy figure, Ghol, who changes the maze's landscape. In the end, Kraine and Culp both die, but they manage to grab the golden orb together.

text: Ghol is described as a "shadow seeker," not a "shadowy figure"

refinement: In this story, the protagonist, Kraine, is competing in a deadly maze game. He must fight his opponent, Culp, and avoid the shadow seeker, Ghol, who changes the maze's landscape. In the end, Kraine and Culp both die, but they manage to grab the golden orb together.

answer: Kraine is in a maze with Culp, a pro. He needs to get to the orb in the center of the maze. He needs to watch out for Ghol, a shadow seeker who changes the environment of the maze. Kraine uses his knives to distract Culp and get to the orb. Culp kills Kraine and they both die.

text: They both reach the orb and kill each other

refinement: Kraine is in a maze with Culp, a pro. He needs to get to the orb in the center of the maze. He needs to watch out for Ghol, a shadow seeker who changes the environment of the maze. Kraine uses his knives to distract Culp and get to the orb. Culp and Kraine both reach the orb but kill each other at the same time.


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_AIPYSURUS FUSCUS_, commonly known as the DUSKY SEA SNAKE or TIMOR REEF SNAKE, is a species of sea snake in the family Elapidae.[1] It is found in the Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia and East Timor and has been classified as endangered.[2]

Description and taxonomy

_A. fuscus_ tends to be dark, colored purplish brown, brown, or blackish brown above. It occasionally has paler bands on the lower flanks. The center of each lateral scale is occasionally darker, giving the appearance of longitudinal striations.[3] It is a member of the subfamily Hydrophiinae, or marine elapid snakes.[4] The species name of _A. fuscus_ derives from the Latin term _fuscus,_ which translates to “dusky” or “dark,” in reference to the snake's coloration.[5] The species is thought to not usually grow beyond in length, although substantially larger specimens have been found. It is thought to reach reproductive maturity after three or four years, have an average generation time of five years, and an average lifespan of ten.[6]

Behavior and ecology

The snake is venomous. It is also viviparous, or live-bearing.[7] A 2006 study suggested that it was most closely related to _Aipysurus laevis_, with which it has been documented as hybridizing.[8][9] It has been recorded as feeding on fish eggs and eels, as well as on wrasses and gobies. The species has a shallow depth range, generally from the surface down to .[10]

Habitat and distribution

_A. fuscus_ primarily inhabits reefs in shallow marine habitats. It has occasionally been recorded at depths of up to .[11] The only reliable reports of this species in the wild are from the Timor Sea, from the reefs of Ashmore, Cartier and Hibernia of the Ashmore and Cartier Islands, and the reefs of Scott and Seringapatam. Not more than five subpopulations are thought to exist, and the overall population is severely fragmented. The type specimen was reported as being collected off the coast of Sulawesi, but this location has been called into question. This, combined with the observation that the species only uses a small depth range, has led the International Union for Conservation of Nature to conclude that the snake has a range of less than .[12]

Conservation status

Catch rates for the species declined drastically between 1998 and 2007, in which year no specimens were found. The estimated decline in the population of _A. fuscus_ is at least 70%.[13] The specific threats to this snake are poorly understood, but they are suspected to have been affected by coral bleaching and general decreases in the health of their ecosystems. These data have led to its being classified as endangered.[14] Ashmore reef, one of five inhabited by _A. fuscus_, has been a nature reserve since 1983.[15]

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title: Aipysurus fuscus

question: What is an Aipysurus Fuscus?

answer: Aipysurus Fuscus is a species of sea snake in the family Elapidae.

text: AIPYSURUS FUSCUS, commonly known as the DUSKY SEA SNAKE or TIMOR REEF SNAKE, is a species of sea snake in the family Elapidae.

answer: Aipysurus Fuscus (A. Fuscus) is an endangered species of venomous sea snake in the marine Elapidae family, subfamily Hydrophiinae. Commonly known as the Dusky Sea Snake or Timor Reef Snake, it is found in the Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia, and East Timor.

text: There is too much information given for the scope of the question.

refinement: Aipysurus Fuscus (A. Fuscus) is an endangered species of venomous sea snake in the marine Elapidae family, subfamily Hydrophiinae.

text: AIPYSURUS FUSCUS, commonly known as the DUSKY SEA SNAKE or TIMOR REEF SNAKE, is a species of sea snake in the family Elapidae.

answer: The Aipysurus Fuscus is a species of sea snake found in the Timor Sea. It is classified as endangered due to a severe decline in population.

text: There is too much information given for the scope of the question.

refinement: The Aipysurus Fuscus is a species of sea snake found in the Timor Sea.

text: AIPYSURUS FUSCUS, commonly known as the DUSKY SEA SNAKE or TIMOR REEF SNAKE, is a species of sea snake in the family Elapidae.

answer: Aipysurus Fuscus is a species of sea snake in the family Elapidae.

question: Describe the Aipysurus Fuscus.

answer: A. Fuscus tends to be dark-colored, usually brown, blackish brown, or purplish-brown. It occasionally has paler bands on the lower flanks. The center of each lateral scale is normally darker, giving the appearance of longitudinal striations. The name A. Fuscus derives from the Latin term "fuscus" which means "dark" or "dusky." The snake is venomous, viviparous, and has an average lifespan of ten years.

text:
_A. fuscus_ tends to be dark, colored purplish brown, brown, or blackish brown above. It occasionally has paler bands on the lower flanks. The center of each lateral scale is occasionally darker, giving the appearance of longitudinal striations.[3] It is a member of the subfamily Hydrophiinae, or marine elapid snakes.[4] The species name of _A. fuscus_ derives from the Latin term _fuscus,_ which translates to “dusky” or “dark,” in reference to the snake's coloration.[5] The species is thought to not usually grow beyond in length, although substantially larger specimens have been found. It is thought to reach reproductive maturity after three or four years, have an average generation time of five years, and an average lifespan of ten.[6]

The snake is venomous. It is also viviparous, or live-bearing.[7] A 2006 study suggested that it was most closely related to _Aipysurus laevis_, with which it has been documented as hybridizing.[8][9] It has been recorded as feeding on fish eggs and eels, as well as on wrasses and gobies. The species has a shallow depth range, generally from the surface down to .[10]

answer: The Aipysurus Fuscus is a species of sea snake in the family Elapidae. It is found in the Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia and East Timor and has been classified as endangered.

text: There could be more detail, especially with regard to its image. "Describe" is a broad ask.

refinement: The Aipysurus Fuscus is a species of sea snake in the family Elapidae. It is found in the Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia and East Timor and has been classified as endangered. The snake is dark-purplish brown, brown, or blackish brown-and occasionally has paler bands on its flanks. It is venomous, and feeds on fish eggs and eels, along with wrasses and gobies.

answer: It is a species of sea snake in the family Elapidae. It is found in the Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia, and East Timor. It is dark colored, and has been classified as endangered.

answer: The Aipysurus Fuscus is a species of sea snake that is dark in color and found in shallow marine habitats. It is considered endangered due to a drastic decline in population.

text: There should be more detail.

refinement: The Aipysurus Fuscus is a species of sea snake that is dark in color and found in shallow marine habitats. It is considered endangered due to a drastic decline in population. The snake is dark-purplish brown, brown, or blackish brown-and occasionally has paler bands on its flanks. It is venomous, and feeds on fish eggs and eels, along with wrasses and gobies.

question: What does the Aipysurus Fuscus feed on?

answer: Fish eggs, eels, gobies, wrasses

text: It has been recorded as feeding on fish eggs and eels, as well as on wrasses and gobies.

answer: The Aipysurus Fuscus is known to feed on fish eggs and eels.

text: It also feeds on wrasses and gobies.

refinement: The Aipysurus Fuscus is known to feed on fish eggs and eels, as well as gobies and wrasses.

answer: The Aipysurus Fuscus feeds on fish eggs and eels, as well as on wrasses and gobies.

text: It has been recorded as feeding on fish eggs and eels, as well as on wrasses and gobies.

answer: The Aipysurus Fuscus feeds on fish eggs and eels.

text: It feeds on other things as well.

refinement: The Aipysurus Fuscus feeds on fish eggs and eels,as well as wrasses and gobies.

text: It has been recorded as feeding on fish eggs and eels, as well as on wrasses and gobies.

question: Where can Aipysurus Fuscus be found?

answer: A. Fuscus primarily inhabits reefs in shallow marine habitats. The only reliable reports of this species in the wild are from the Timor Sea, from the reefs of Ashmore, Cartier, and Hibernia of the Ashmore and Cartier Islands, and the reefs of Scott and Seringapatam.

text: A. fuscus_ primarily inhabits reefs in shallow marine habitats. It has occasionally been recorded at depths of up to .[11] The only reliable reports of this species in the wild are from the Timor Sea, from the reefs of Ashmore, Cartier and Hibernia of the Ashmore and Cartier Islands, and the reefs of Scott and Seringapatam. Not more than five subpopulations are thought to exist, and the overall population is severely fragmented. The type specimen was reported as being collected off the coast of Sulawesi, but this location has been called into question. This, combined with the observation that the species only uses a small depth range, has led the International Union for Conservation of Nature to conclude that the snake has a range of less than

answer: Aipysurus Fuscus is found in the Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia and East Timor.

text: NAKE, is a species of sea snake in the family Elapidae.[1] It is found in the Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia and East Timor and has been classified as endangered.

answer: The Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia, and East Timor.

text: NAKE, is a species of sea snake in the family Elapidae.[1] It is found in the Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia and East Timor and has been classified as endangered.

answer: The Dusky Sea Snake can be found in the Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia and East Timor.

text: NAKE, is a species of sea snake in the family Elapidae.[1] It is found in the Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia and East Timor and has been classified as endangered.

question: Write a ~5 sentence summary.

answer: Aipysurus Fuscus (A. Fuscus) is a species of sea snake in the marine Elapidae family. Commonly known as the Dusky Sea Snake or Timor Reef Snake, it is found in the Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia, and East Timor. The snake is venomous, viviparous, and is considered endangered. A. Fuscus tends to be dark-colored, usually brown, blackish brown, or purplish-brown. It occasionally has paler bands on the lower flanks.

answer: Aipysurus Fuscus, commonly known as the Dusky Sea Snake or Timor Reef Snake, is a species of sea snake in the family Elapidae. It is found in the Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia, and East Timor. It is dark colored, and has been classified as endangered. It is a member of the subfamily Hydrophiinae, or marine elapid snakes. The species name of A. Fuscus derives from the Latin term fuscus, which translates to “dusky” or “dark,” in reference to the snake's coloration.

text: I would add what it eats.

refinement: Aipysurus Fuscus, commonly known as the Dusky Sea Snake or Timor Reef Snake, is a species of sea snake in the family Elapidae. It is found in the Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia, and East Timor. It is dark colored, and has been classified as endangered. It is a member of the subfamily Hydrophiinae, or marine elapid snakes. The species name of A. Fuscus derives from the Latin term fuscus, which translates to “dusky” or “dark,” in reference to the snake's coloration. It eats fish eggs and eels, as well as wrasses and gobies.

answer: The Dusky Sea Snake, Aipysurus fuscus, is a species of sea snake found in the Timor Sea. It is classified as endangered due to a drastic decline in population, and is thought to inhabit only a few small areas. The main threats to the species are poorly understood, but are suspected to be related to coral bleaching and ecosystem health. Ashmore Reef, one of the few areas where the Dusky Sea Snake is found, is a nature reserve.

text: I would add what it eats.

refinement: The Dusky Sea Snake, Aipysurus fuscus, is a species of sea snake found in the Timor Sea. It is classified as endangered due to a drastic decline in population, and is thought to inhabit only a few small areas. The main threats to the species are poorly understood, but are suspected to be related to coral bleaching and ecosystem health. Ashmore Reef, one of the few areas where the Dusky Sea Snake is found, is a nature reserve. It eats fish eggs and eels, as well as wrasses and gobies.

answer: The Dusky Sea Snake is a species of sea snake found in the Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia and East Timor. It is classified as endangered.

text: This needs more details.

refinement: The Dusky Sea Snake is a species of sea snake found in the Timor Sea between Australia, Indonesia and East Timor. It is classified as endangered. It is a venomous snake, and eats fish eggs, eels, wrasses, and gobies. Its habitat is primarily reefs in shallow marine areas. There was a decline in the population of this snake between 1997-2007.


text:
The warrior sat with his back to an old gnarled tree, his eyes closed. He wondered how he could be so weak. Fifteen years of training was not enough to protect her, the only one he ever felt that loved him. His muscles twitched involuntarily, blood seeped slowly from many wounds. The goblins had done a good job of beating his body after he had lost consciousness.

If only the cowards hadn't used Ellen to distract him, if they had fought as men with honor, No! He could not blame the goblins, the loss he suffered was due to his weakness. If he would have killed them straight away then maybe, but there is no way to change things now.

Slowly he opened his eyes. Blurry eyed and foggy minded he checked himself. His tan flesh was a dark black color where it wasn't caked with blood, at first he thought it was due to bruising, then after touching his forearm, he discovered it was a fine black powder, "What is this?" he pondered, looking ahead where the beautiful farmhouse had once been was nothing but a heaping pile of smoldering ash. The filth burned his home to the ground, probably after killing Ellen.

He wept. He wept for himself, for Ellen, for the life they had only recently started together. He had fallen in love with her when he was a mere boy. He became a fighter in hopes of impressing her only to find that those many years ago she had fancied him as a simple farmer's son. After what seemed like an hour he tried to stand, his legs shook, his vision swam but he did not falter. He limped towards the pile intending to find and give Ellen a decent burial.

He found the charred remains of a skeleton that was roughly her size. He could feel vomit coming up his throat, but he swallowed it, it left a bitter taste, he ignored it. He walked to the tool shed that was a few yards behind the house, far enough away that it was not consumed by the flames, but the smoke had done some damage. He opened the shed and pulled out a spade, he began digging her grave, and as he did more tears sprung from his eyes. Though his muscles ached he forced them on, inch by inch, the hole got deeper, pound by pound dirt was moved.

After digging approximately seven feet, he stopped. He hoisted himself out, collected the bones together and set them down into the grave and replaced the moved earth. He knew no words of peace or parting, he had no faith in gods of any kind. He simply kneeled before her grave and bade her farewell. As he stood up, he heard a thin voice behind him say, "One should never leave the body of a loved one, not without a cleric to guide them on to the After."

Though startled he showed no signs, he turned and faced the owner of the voice, not a spec of flesh to be seen, he wore a hood that was so low it covered most of his face, and whatever wasn't covered by hood was covered by his high collar. His cloak was the color of sand, his robe the color of dried blood, he wore black leather gloves and boots.

"I know no clerics, and it is not within my ability to convince one to come out this far from a city for a simple farmers wife." The man slumped his shoulders as if insulted, he pulled from within his robe an ankh made of silver. He walked past the warrior and stood at the foot of the grave. Carefully, reverently, he placed the ankh on the center of the grave and started saying a prayer of passing in the tongue of the ancients.

The ankh began to glow a bright blue, and it sank into the dirt as if water, being soaked up greedily by the thirsty earth. "My apologies, and many thanks cleric, by pure chance you happened upon me when I needed you most." said the warrior.

The cleric chuckled, which sounded more like a series of light coughs. "This was not chance, the great Asheros brought me to this location. If not for him, your wife may have been found by the scavengers and turned into a disgusting undead, but now", said the cleric, " the land is consecrated and cannot be touched by that ilk. Her peace will never be disturbed."

The warrior bowed his head and said " Again I apologize, please tell me your name so I know who I owe my service to."

Within his hood the cleric smiled. "My name is Delphose," he said, struggling to hold back laughter, "Delphose Anari. I follow the path laid before me by the great Asheros."

With his head still bowed, the warrior pleaded "Please tell me more of Asheros. Never before have I heard of this being."

The cleric gasped as if dumbfounded "Never heard of Asheros?! The lesser gods bow before him. When he walks the earth trembles. When he is angered, storms tear lands apart, he is a god who wishes to purify our world of evil so it may be at peace."

"Purify of evil..." mutters the warrior, he made a decision then, "I will join you on your journey Delphose, wherever you may be going, I will assist you in any way that I can. To rid the world of evil so none will have to suffer as I have." The warrior again looked over his small farm, at the damaged crops, the burned home, and lastly his eyes came to rest on the grave.

"I will teach you of Asheros, if you believe in his great power, you will be remade. Your past matters not, only your future matters to his greatness. You will be the first in centuries to be inducted into his knighthood..." The farmers face lit up at the thought of fighting in the name of a god, as a knight no less. Ellen would be proud. If only...

title: Creating Disposition, The rise of the first knight of Asheros. <1000 words.

question: Who was Ellen?

answer: Ellen was the farmers wife.

text: "I know no clerics, and it is not within my ability to convince one to come out this far from a city for a simple farmers wife" is evidence that Ellen was the protagonist's wife.

answer: Ellen was the warrior's wife

text: "I know no clerics, and it is not within my ability to convince one to come out this far from a city for a simple farmers wife" is evidence that Ellen was the protagonist's wife.

answer: Ellen was the farmer's wife.

text: "I know no clerics, and it is not within my ability to convince one to come out this far from a city for a simple farmers wife" is evidence that Ellen was the protagonist's wife.

answer: Ellen was the farmer's wife who was killed by goblins.

text: "I know no clerics, and it is not within my ability to convince one to come out this far from a city for a simple farmers wife" is evidence that Ellen was the protagonist's wife.

question: How did Ellen die?

answer: Ellen died when the goblins used her to distract the warrior.

text: Could make it clearer that the goblins were the once who killed her.

refinement: Ellen was killed by the goblins, who used her to distract the warrior.

text: "If only the cowards hadn't used Ellen to distract him" is evidence that the goblins used Ellen to distract the warrior.

answer: Ellen was killed by goblins.

answer: She was killed by goblins.

answer: Ellen was killed by goblins who set fire to her home, after murdering her.

text: "The filth burned his home to the ground, probably after killing Ellen" is evidence that Ellen was killed prior to her home being set on fire.

question: Who is Asheros?

answer: Asheros is a god who wishes to purify the world of evil. Those who follow him are inducted into his knighthood.

text: The second line does not expand upon Asheros's identity; rather, it speaks of his followers.

refinement: Asheros is a god who wishes to purify the world of evil.

text: "he is a god who wishes to purify our world of evil so it may be at peace" is evidence that Asheros is a god who wishes to purify the world of evil.

text: No answer is given.

refinement: A god who wishes to purify the world of evil to create peace.

answer: Asheros is a powerful god who wants to destroy evil.

answer: He is a god who wants to purify the world of evil.

question: What is Delphose?

answer: Delphose is a cleric of Asheros, a god who wishes to purify the world of evil. The warrior pledges his service to Delphose and will be inducted into Asheros' knighthood.

text: The second line is not relevant to the question being asked.

refinement: Delphose is a cleric of Asheros, a god who wishes to purify the world of evil.

answer: Delphose is a cleric who worships Asheros.

text: No answer is given.

refinement: Delphose is a cleric and a follower of Asheros.

answer: Delphose is a cleric of Asheros.

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: After a warrior's home is raided by goblins and his wife is slain, he mourns and buries her. He is then visited by a cleric of Asheros who consecrates the burial site and invites the warrior to become a knight.

text: The summary does not explain who Asheros is.

refinement: After a warrior's home is raided by goblins and his wife is slain, he mourns and buries her. He is then visited by a cleric of Asheros, a powerful deity who wishes to rid the world of evil, who consecrates the burial site and invites the warrior to become a knight.

text: Phrasing of the last sentence more clearly mention that the role of knight is in service of Asheros.

refinement: After a warrior's home is raided by goblins and his wife is slain, he mourns and buries her. He is then visited by a cleric of Asheros, a powerful deity who wishes to rid the world of evil. The cleric consecrates the burial site and invites the warrior to become a knight serving Asheros.

text: "He opened the shed and pulled out a spade, he began digging her grave, and as he did more tears sprung from his eyes" is evidence that the warrior mouns and buries his wife.

answer: The warrior decides to join the cleric on a journey to rid the world of evil, in the name of the god Asheros. He hopes that this will help him to find peace after the tragic loss of his beloved.

text: Does not mention how the goblins killed his wife.

refinement: The warrior decides to join the cleric on a journey to rid the world of evil, in the name of the god Asheros. He hopes that this will help him to find peace after his wife was killed by goblins.

text: It is not clear who "the cleric" is.

refinement: A cleric comes and consecrates the grave of a warrior's wife/ The warrior decides to join the cleric on a journey to rid the world of evil, in the name of the god Asheros. He hopes that this will help him to find peace after his wife was killed by goblins.

answer: The warrior is mourning the loss of his wife, Ellen, who was killed by goblins. A cleric named Delphose appears and offers to induct the warrior into Asheros' knighthood.

text: Does not mention what the warrior decides about the offer.

refinement: The warrior is mourning the loss of his wife, Ellen, who was killed by goblins. A cleric named Delphose appears and offers to induct the warrior into Asheros' knighthood. The warrior agrees to join the knighthood and go on a quest to rid the world of evil.

answer: The warrior is a farmer who falls in love with a woman named Ellen. He trains for years to impress her, but when he finally does, she is killed by goblins. The warrior is then approached by a cleric who tells him that he has been chosen by the god Asheros to be the first knight of Asheros.

text: While the warrior will be the first in centuries to join the knighthood, he is not the first overall.

refinement: The warrior is a farmer who falls in love with a woman named Ellen. He trains for years to impress her, but when he finally does, she is killed by goblins. The warrior is then approached by a cleric who tells him that he has been chosen by the god Asheros to be the first knight in centuries to join Asheros's knighthood.

text: The phrasing implies that his wife is killed right after he managed to impress her.

refinement: The warrior is a farmer who falls in love with a woman named Ellen. She is killed by goblins. The warrior is then approached by a cleric who tells him that he has been chosen by the god Asheros to be the first knight in centuries to join Asheros's knighthood.


text:
_REICHELTIA HALSTEADI_, HALSTEAD'S TOADFISH, is a species of pufferfish endemic to Australia. This species grows to a length of TL. This species is the only known member of its genus.

Description

The Halstead's toadfish is a species representing a monotypic genus of tetraodontid fishes. The most obvious characteristic of the Halstead's toadfish is an elongated body that is rounded dorsally. The body is also flattened ventrally, tapering to a narrow caudal penduncle. It has a small terminal mouth with no chin and triturating teeth are absent. The top of pectoral fin base is below the lower margin of eye and the pectoral fin margins are rounded. The Nasal organ has two small, almost equally sized openings. The eyes are round, moderate in size and the rim is completely adnate. The lips are moderately thick and covered with numerous short papillae. The prefrontals are moderately large, rounded, each with a small olfactory nerve foramen; frontals wide over orbit; sphenotic not contacting supraoccipital. The spines are restricted to the nape and belly.[1]

The color of the body varies, the ground color of dorsum is pale yellowish green with many irregular light browns or reddish-brown blotches. Dark brown bands cross the dorsum at the eyes, between the eyes and pectoral fin base, just behind the pectoral fin base and are extending down side at dorsal fin base, and at the caudal fin base. Brownish blotches and yellow green background continue to mid-lateral region of the fish and are replaced by small silverfish-grey flecks which gradually merges into the white belly. The cheeks and lower lateral surfaces have a silverfish-grey sheen. Spinose region of the belly is white. All fins are pale, and a reddish-brown patch is seen on anterior of pectoral fin insert.[2]

Distribution and habitat

Halstead's toadfish is distributed in the southwestern Pacific, from Queensland to New South Wales, Australia. It is found at depths ranging from 1 to 80 metres.[3] [Halstead's toadfish range] Reicheltia halsteadi is demersal marine species. It is typically found on sand just beyond turbulent zone off surf beaches[4] and can also be found in sheltered bays.[5] Young fishes occur in small schools over sandy bottoms. It does not appear to be overly common throughout its known range.

Diet

The feeding habits of Halstead's toadfish have been little researched in general. However research into similar demersal tetraodontid fishes would suggest that their diet consists mostly of algae and small invertebrates such as crustaceans and mollusks. They can survive on a completely vegetarian diet if their environment is lacking resources, but prefer an omnivorous food selection.[6]

Toxicity

The muscles of Halstead's toadfish contain less than 10 MU/g of tetrodotoxin in its tissue and considered harmless.[7] Many species of pufferfish bear this toxin, obtaining it from tetrodotoxin-containing bacteria in their diet.[8]

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[4] Kuiter, R.H., 1993. Coastal fishes of south-eastern Australia. University of Hawaii Press. Honolulu, Hawaii. 437 p

[5] Shao, K., Liu, M., Hardy, G., Jing, L., Leis, J.L. & Matsuura, K. 2014. Reicheltia halsteadi. The IUCN Red List of Threatened Species 2014: e.T193685A2260243

[6] “Puffer Fish: Fun Facts & Photos of Puffer Fish - (Tetraodontidae)”. _Our Beautiful Planet_. 2017-02-07. Retrieved 2017-03-30.

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[8] Noguchi, Tamao; Arakawa, Osamu (2008). “Tetrodotoxin – Distribution and Accumulation in Aquatic Organisms, and Cases of Human Intoxication”. _Marine Drugs_. 6 (2): 220–42. doi:10.3390/md20080011. PMC 2525488 . PMID 18728726.

title: Reicheltia halsteadi

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Describe Halstead's toadfish.

answer: The Halstead's toadfish is an elongated, rounded fish with a small triturating mouth and sans sensory teeth. The upper fin edges on the membrane are also rounded. They are a shallow-water grayish fish with irregular, light-colored blotches.

text: The response contains some inaccurate statements.

refinement: The Halstead's toadfish is an elongated, rounded fish with no chin and triturating teeth. The upper fin edges on the membrane are also rounded. They are shallow-water grayish fish with irregular, light-colored blotches.

answer: It is a pufferfish. It has an elongated body that is round at the back but flat at the front. The eyes are round, and it lips are thick. It is multicolored, pale yellow-green at the back, with many irregular reddish brown blotches.

answer: Halstead's toadfish is an elongated body that is rounded dorsally and flattened ventrally. It has round eyes with a silverfish-grey sheen and restricted spines restricted primarily to the nape and belly. The coloration is pale yellowish green with many irregular light brown or reddish brown blotches. The toadfish has little known diet, but is thought to primarily eat algae and small invertebrates. Finally, its muscle tissue has less than 10 MU/g of tetrodotoxin, making it harmless.

answer: The Halstead's toadfish is an elongated pufferfish that has a flat body with rounded pectoral fin margins. The coloration of the body varies from pale yellowish green to light brown and has many irregular blotches. The lips are covered with many short papillae, the spinous region of the belly is white, and the fins are pale. The toadfish contains less than 10 MU/g of tetrodotoxin in its tissue and is harmless.

answer: It has a long and elongated body that is rounded dorsally and flattened ventrally, tapering to a narrow caudal penduncle. It has two small almost equally sized nasal openings and its body is paler on the dorsal and lateral areas.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Where is Halstead's toadfish found?

answer: The fish is found in the Southwestern Pacific, from Queensland to New South Wales, Australia. It is found at depths ranging from 1 to 80 meters. It is typically found on sand just beyond turbulent zones off surf beaches.

answer: Halstead's toadfish is found in the southwestern Pacific, from Queensland to New South Wales, Australia.

answer: Australia.

text: More details would make the response better.

refinement: It can be found in the southwestern Pacific in Australia. It resides in depths of 1 to 80 meters.

answer: The Halstead's toadfish is found in the southwest Pacific off of Queensland to New South Wales, Australia at depths of 1 to 80 meters.

answer: The Halstead's toadfish is found in southwestern Pacific waters, from Queensland to New South Wales, Australia. It typically resides in the sand near surf beaches and sheltered bays.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the toxicity of the toadfish.

answer: The muscles of the Halstead's toadfish contain less than 10 mu/g of tetrodotoxin and are harmless.

answer: It is harmless. However it does have 10 mu//g of tetrodoxtin in its tissue. Many species of pufferfish bear this toxin.

answer: The muscles of the toadfish contain less than 10 MU/g of tetrodotoxin in its tissue, which is considered harmless. Many species of pufferfish bear this toxin, obtaining it from tetrodotoxin-containing bacteria in their diet.

answer: The muscles of Halstead's toadfish contain less than 10 MU/g of tetrodotoxin, making it harmless. Many species of pufferfish contain this toxin, but the Halstead's toadfish does not.

text: The later part of the response is inaccurate.

refinement: The muscles of Halstead's toadfish contain less than 10 MU/g of tetrodotoxin, making it harmless.

answer: Many species of pufferfish contain tetrodotoxin of the bacteria in their diet, indicating a natural source of the toxin. The toadfish only has a concentration of less than 10 MU/gram in its tissue.


text:
I'm an odd memory in most minds.  Like a harrowing communal conscience of migratory birds or a sea breeze that took a train to the prairies and is seen walking along the street.  I suppose I'm a sort of stationary, a figment used to paint a portrait of understanding but this is really strange since I am not at all like a brush or ladle or roller or whatever would make sense to paint something.  I've been a transient congested throat in days gone by.  I swam from seashores to deep blue waters and sailed away.  All in all I think I've had things pretty good up until now.  But right now I feel like a bag of squeezed lemons left to rot, like I've gone through a garlic press alongside the garlic, I feel like I can't even like this situation and I really wanted to like it.

Let me clarify.

I believe in god about as much as I believe in myself.  If you get to know me you'll find I don't believe in myself that much.  But if you get to know me better you'd know that I've met him.  I'm not saying him in that god is male it's just that calling him *it* seems strange and it's a default.  With that in mind it was a day just like today with me on a stage but I was in the middle of a wheat field and opera singers dressed as vikings were scattered around looking for cues, lines and presumably marbles in the dirt.  It hit me that I shouldn't be there, I was supposed to be somewhere else but I felt if I left now to I would likely be eaten or worse, stood on, read then knocked around by the vikings.

It was at this point that god pulled up in a brand new jeep made out of a thunderstorm and waved his arms in a motion that very distinctly triggered a perhaps unbelievable but entirely real sense that he was god and I should get on his thunderstorm-jeep-of-love to ride away to eternal safety and abundance.  So I hopped up onto the cloud and into the passenger seat.  He looked at me in a way only god could with eyes as deep as artesian wells, with a sort of sisyphean tenure gained only after watching over everything for ten times eternity and then started speaking with a very plain voice.

"Would you like to take the wheel?" he asked and I didn't really want to but this was sort of troubling because.... why would anyone turn down an offer from god and he said "It's alright, with the exception of your neighbor nobody has actually wanted to drive the thunderstorm the first time meeting me.  In general it is an odd question to ask, isn't it?"

I smiled politely.

Then he said "Alright here's the deal.  You get three questions answered.  Anything in the realm of conceivable knowledge of the infinity that is me.  Three of them.  Just ask whenever and I'll answer but when I answer the last one you will die."

"What!? Why?" I blurted out of shock as he looked at me.  I looked right back at those constellations within constellations within a walmart parking lot folded over into itself and back out towards the sunrise.

I smiled realizing the game was ruined and asked "Are you serious?"

Then he laughed, we drove a short while in silence and he dropped me off a block away from home still a little agitated by his interactions with my neighbor the week before.

"You can't screw this up by just asking silly off the top of your mind questions.  Here is my email address.  Send your questions there and I'll have an answer for you written out within a day or two." god said as plainly as before from inside his thunderstorm with the window rolled down while gesturing blindly in the air to make a point or sign what he was saying but it was entirely lost on me.  He could tell by my glazed look it was time to go so he simply said "Get a job" and drove off.

So now.  Slightly but not entirely glazed in circumstance I am struggling with this interaction.  I can know anything in the universe via email at the cost of my life.  I don't really have a desire to acquire knowledge or a need for something like this... so here I am a bag of lemons staring off at the sky like it is staring back in part of that endless crashing gaze of god wondering what the hell I should do with myself.  Aside from getting a job.

title: I've been writing a lot of poetry for a while but then I started reading Richard Brautigan and his stuff made me want to try short stories.  Here is my attempt at something weird and relatively short.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who is the narrator?

answer: The narrator is an individual who used to be a transient but has since been invited by god into the world of knowledge. Despite the dangers, the narrator is tempted by the opportunity to ask god anything. The narrator is still unsure what to do about this.

answer: Not much is known about him, he's only really defined by this visit from God.

answer: The narrator is a perplexed, wandering soul of sorts who has met god in surreal circumstances and is mulling over the options presented to them.

answer: The narrator is some sort of mix between a god and a self-blamed person.

answer: a bag of squeezed lemons

text: You could have chosen from a wide variety of options-the text is very open to interpretation-but this is not backed up by descriptive or anecdotal evidence.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How does the narrator meet God?

answer: The narrator meets God while on stage in a wheat field, surrounded by opera singers dressed as vikings. God pulls up in a jeep made of a thunderstorm, and offers to answer three questions from the narrator with the stipulation that after answering the third question, the narrator would die.

answer: On a stage while the narrator is supposed to be somewhere else.

text: It seems, from the text, the narrator is on some sort of a road trip.

refinement: It seems that they are on a road trip or traveling.

answer: God pulls up in a Jeep made of a thunderstorm when the narrator wants an excuse to leave the event he's attending.

answer: They are on a stage in a wheat field and surrounded by opera singers. God pulls up in a car and offers them a chance to drive. God says he will answer 3 questions, but the narrator would die after the last one.

text: This has extraneous information unrelated to the question.

refinement: They are on a stage in a wheat field and surrounded by opera singers. God pulls up in a car and offers them a chance to drive.

answer: The narrator meets God while participating in a theatrical event in a wheat field. God appears in a thunderstorm-shaped jeep made out of a storm, and he offers the narrator three questions about anything in the realm of conceivable knowledge. The narrator does not really want to take this opportunity having realized the game is ruined. God then advises the narrator to get a job.

text: This has quite a bit of information that is irrelevant to the question.

refinement: The narrator meets God while participating in a theatrical event in a wheat field. God appears in a thunderstorm-shaped jeep made out of a storm, and he offers the narrator three questions about anything in the realm of conceivable knowledge.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Describe God.

answer: He is seemingly omnipresent and omniscient, and speaks plainly. He turns up in a jeep made of thunderstorm and offers answers to anything conceivable if the kid takes the wheel.

answer: God seems complex, and has a sense of humor. He also seems trustworthy, giving only three questions rather than something that would completely destroy the mortal in every way. He is knowledgeable, experienced and powerful. He is willing and ready to help people, but also warns them of the consequences. Overall, God is something to revere and be cautious of.

answer: He is assigned male pronouns by the narrator, has "eyes as deep as artesian wells", and speaks "with a very plain voice."

answer: God is a powerful being with incredible knowledge who engages in dialog with those who meet him. He is aloof but fundamentally benevolent. He is frightening in his power but willing to protect and educate those who seek him out.

answer: God has the impressive ability to change into different forms, and seems to have the power to change anything into anything.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the narrator ask God?

answer: The first questions are a startled, "What!? Why?" and the actual questions he has the opportunity to ask are undecided.

answer: That will become clear in the next circle

answer: The narrator asks God three questions about anything in the universe. After the third question, the narrator dies.

answer: The narrator asks God three questions.

answer: A question, it's not clear.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Which religion's version of God is presented here?

answer: The God presented in the passage appears to be of the Abrahamic variety.

answer: It's not stated.

answer: It is a religious description

answer: Unclear, and not important, from this story.

answer: The presented god is most likely a representation of the Abrahamic god.

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: The narrator considers the offer from god, which is the ability to ask three questions in exchange for their life. Despite being hesitant, the narrator eventually realizes they are intrigued enough to get the answers from god in an email. The narrator concludes by wondering what they should do moving forward.

answer: In this short story, a character starts to question their existence when god approaches them and offers them any knowledge imaginable at the cost of their life. Deciding to jump in head first, the character realizes they are completely unsure how to proceed and wonders if they should ask life-changing questions or make their focus getting a job.

answer: The narrator claims to have met god and then asks him to answer any three questions of the narrator's choosing. Before god provides the answers, he drops the narrator off at their home.

text: One of the main points is that the narrator will die after god answers their questions.

refinement: The narrator claims to have met god and then asks him to answer any three questions of the narrator's choosing-with the catch that the narrator will die after they receive the last answer. Before god provides the answers, he drops the narrator off at their home.

answer: The narrator has met god and received the opportunity to ask him anything in return for giving up their life when the three questions are answered. However, because they still have unanswered questions, they cannot decide what to ask.

text: One of the main points is that the narrator will die after god answers their questions.

refinement: The narrator has met god and received the opportunity to ask him anything in return for giving up their life when the three questions are answered. However, because they still have unanswered questions, they cannot decide what to ask. The catch is that they will die after their last question.

answer: Seemingly randomly, God pulls up in a Jeep made of a thunderstorm when the narrator wants an excuse to leave the event he's attending, and offers the narrator the opportunity to have three questions answered on the condition that the narrator dies after asking the final question. God gives the narrator an email address to send the questions, and the narrator feels lost knowing the secrets of the universe could be within reach.


text:
This is my first story, so sorry if it's bad!

You guys have been asking for it. So here it is. My story.
On September 19, 1998, Kathy Logan gave birth to a girl named Amy. That girl was me. Or so I thought. Though I shouldn’t get to that until later, I don’t want to confuse you.
Under the care of Kathy and her husband Jake, I lived happily for 14 years. Nice house, always fed, given many things. I was very spoiled..
School was never a huge problem for me. It is a preppy private school. I wasn’t popular, but I wasn’t a loser either. I was kind of just average. I had a group of very close friends, and we were all very happy. We did some things I am not very proud of, like bullying the scholarships and playing pranks on teachers. If I had known what I have felt like in the past year, I would have stopped. I thought my friends and I stuck together through everything, no matter what.  I was wrong, because when I hit 15, everything changed.
This isn’t an average story about a girl who went to high school, and suddenly “her life changed, and everything was different.” This is a story about a girl who found out her whole life was a lie. One lie so big it had to be kept from everyone, because if it wasn’t, the world would know the real truth. So a lie turned into a secret. And this secret was one that could get anyone involved in a lot of trouble. One secret so big, yet so small, because only two people were in on it. And 2 can keep a secret if one of them is dead, right? My (fake) father certainly thought so.
Now I have to confess something. I told everyone reading this a lie. That’s right, remember the first paragraph where it said that Kathy Logan gave birth to me? Well that isn’t the truth. Kathy Logan didn’t exist until after I was born. And neither did Jake.
The truth is that my birth mother gave birth to me on September 19, 1998. But that was not her first birth. She had had not one, not two, not three, but five other births. And I would be the last one.
I was with my birth parents and siblings for six months. Six months of normality and of truth. Unfortunately that is the only amount of time I’ve ever had my life like that, and I barely remember it.
On October 14, 1999, my mother told me to go play outside. With me refusing, she put me out there saying that I needed fresh air, and I hadn’t had any that day when my siblings already had. We had a large backyard apparently, and in my anger I went to the far corner of the yard. It was from there I watched my house burn down.
I didn’t remember this until I was told it. I now remember sirens, and smoke, and I didn’t comprehend much more than that. But then I remember a man picking me up. And it wasn’t a firefighter. It was the man who started the fire, along with his wife. They adopted me as their own, renamed me Amy, and changed their names to Kathy and Jake Logan. That’s right, I don’t know my actual first or last name.
But as I said before, I was never told this. My life was a lie. I didn’t find out by somebody telling me. I found out by another death. The death of Kathy Logan.
Behind every death is a motive. I have mentioned two killings already. And those motives were the two most common motives out there. Money and disagreement.
I never knew why my (fake) parents had so much money. They didn’t seem to work that hard. I didn’t find it odd. But it was. And my “close” friends noticed.
My birth parents had money. I don’t know much about them, not even their names, but money is the one thing I do know about them. Because it was not our priceless pictures or our clothes that were saved from the fire. It was our money. And it was saved by – you guessed it – Jake and Kathy Logan.
So then why did Kathy die? I said disagreement but that doesn’t give much away. It was because Kathy, even though she had done some horrible things in her life, cared about me. Had some good in her. Jake on the other hand did not.
Kathy wanted to tell me. Everything. She thought I cared about them too much to tell. And if I hadn’t known that she was going to tell me, I might have told the police. But I have some forgiveness in me.
So Jake choked her to death. And covered his tracks perfectly by staging a hanging. Said there was too much pressure on her at work, and nobody suspected a thing. Because little did he know I was a witness. Of both of his killings. Another thing he didn’t know is that Kathy wrote a letter to me in the event that this would happen. She made sure Jake wouldn’t get it and it would go directly to me. And that is how I found out about what happened.
After that, everything changed. I became depressed, heartbroken, and I could barely look at my father. My friends also started to neglect me. I don’t know why, I didn’t tell them anything, but they started to think I was broke because I was depressed. I wasn’t rich, which apparently I had to be to be their friend. They left me at the time I needed them most. And so I got lonely.
I told another lie. The first line of this book was “You guys have been asking for it.” But there is no “you guys.” It’s just me, myself and I. And so I’m faced with the decision whether to do Kathy good and not tell on Jake, or tell on him and have the satisfaction of seeing him get locked up.
Last night I had a dream. I was playing chess with Jake. The pieces on my side were my birth family and Kathy, and me as the king. He took every one of my pieces, and put his piece in the perfect position to beat me. It felt like hours passed and I couldn’t decide what to do. He started to get impatient. Finally he smiled coldly and said, “Your move, Amy.”

title: Lies

question: What is the twist in this story?

answer: The twist in this story is that the protagonist is not the daughter of the people who raised her.

text: The answer could include more information about the twist.

refinement: The twist in this story is that the protagonist is not the daughter of the people who raised her, and those people killed her real family.

text: The protagonist's "parents" are not her birth parents, they are her "fake" parents.

answer: The twist in this story is that the protagonist's "parents" Kathy and Jake are not her real parents, but rather her birth parents' murderers. They killed her birth parents and adopted her, and she only found out when Kathy died and left her a letter.

text: The protagonist's "parents" are not her birth parents, they are her "fake" parents.

text: Kathy did leave the protagonist a letter detailing what happened.

answer: Amy is not the daughter of Kathy and Jake, but the daughter of a different couple.

text: The answer could include more information about the twist.

refinement: Amy is not the daughter of Kathy and Jake, but the daughter of a different couple who Kathy and Jake murdered.

text: The protagonist's "parents" are not her birth parents, they are her "fake" parents.

answer: Her parents are not her real parents.

text: The answer could use clearer pronouns.

refinement: The protagonist's parents are not her real parents.

text: The answer could provide more information about the twist.

refinement: The protagonist's parents are not her real parents and they murdered her birth family.

text: The protagonist's "parents" are not her birth parents, they are her "fake" parents.

question: Who dies in the story?

answer: Kathy Logan dies in the story.

text: Kathy Logan is not the only one to die in the story.

refinement: Kathy Logan and the protagonist's birth family dies in the story.

text: Kathy Logan is "choked..to death" in the story.

answer: The main character's adoptive parents, Kathy and Jake, both die.

text: Jake does not die in the story.

refinement: The main character's adoptive parent, Kathy, dies.

text: Kathy Logan is not the only one to die in the story.

refinement: The main character's adoptive parent, Kathy, dies, along with the protagonist's birth family.

text: Kathy Logan is "choked..to death" in the story.

answer: Kathy Logan.

text: The answer could be phrased in a complete sentence.

text: Kathy Logan is not the only one to die in the story.

refinement: Kathy Logan and the protagonist's birth family dies in the story.

text: Kathy Logan is "choked..to death" in the story.

answer: Amy's real parents.

text: The answer could be phrased as a complete sentence.

text: Amy's real parents are not the only one to die in the story.

refinement: Amy's real parents and Kathy Logan die in the story.

text: Amy's real family does die in the story.

question: Why did Amy's fake parents want to kill her real parents?

answer: They had money.

text: The answer could be phrased as a complete sentence.

refinement: Kathy and Jake killed Amy's birth family because they had money.

text: The protagonist's "birth parents had money."

text: The protagonist said the first murder was motivated by money.

answer: They wanted to get rid of the competition.

text: The answer is incorrect. The text states that it was for money.

refinement: Kathy and Jake killed Amy's birth family because they had money.

answer: Amy's fake parents wanted to kill her real parents because they wanted to keep their money.

text: The answer could use a clearer sentence structure.

refinement: Amy's fake parents wanted to kill her real parents for their money.

text: The protagonist's "birth parents had money."

text: The protagonist said the first murder was motivated by money.

answer: The fake parents killed the real parents for money and/or disagreement.

text: The protagonist says that the second murder was motivated by disagreement, not the first.

refinement: The fake parents killed the real parents for money.

text: The protagonist's "birth parents had money."

text: The protagonist said the first murder was motivated by money.

question: What is Amy struggling with at the end of the story?

answer: She is struggling with the decision whether to do Kathy good and not tell on Jake, or tell on him and have the satisfaction of seeing him get locked up.

text: The answer could clarify a pronoun to make it less confusing.

refinement: Amy is struggling with the decision whether to do Kathy good and not tell on Jake, or tell on him and have the satisfaction of seeing him get locked up.

text: Amy is "faced with the decision whether to do Kathy good and not tell on Jake, or tell on him and have the satisfaction of seeing him get locked up."

answer: Whether to go to the police about her fake father, Jake.

text: The answer could use a clearer either/or statement.

refinement: Whether or not to go to the police about her fake father, Jake.

text: The answer could be phrased in a complete sentence.

refinement: Amy is struggling with the decision whether or not to go to the police about her fake father, Jake.

text: Amy is "faced with the decision whether to do Kathy good and not tell on Jake, or tell on him and have the satisfaction of seeing him get locked up."

answer: Amy is struggling with whether or not to tell the police about Jake.

text: Amy is "faced with the decision whether to do Kathy good and not tell on Jake, or tell on him and have the satisfaction of seeing him get locked up."

answer: Amy is struggling with whether or not to turn her father in to the police for the murders he committed. She is conflicted because she still has some love for her father, despite his crimes.

text: Amy never states that she is conflicted due to her love for her father.

refinement: Amy is struggling with whether or not to turn her father in to the police for the murders he committed.

text: Amy is "faced with the decision whether to do Kathy good and not tell on Jake, or tell on him and have the satisfaction of seeing him get locked up."

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: The story is about a girl named Amy who discovers her parents are not actually her parents. Then her false father kills her mother, and she has to decide whether to go to the police or not.

text: Everything in the summary happened in the story.

answer: The protagonist discovers that her entire life has been a lie, and that her adoptive parents are murderers. She is faced with the decision of whether to turn them in or not, but is conflicted because she still loves them.

text: The protagonist never explicitly states that she is conflicted due to her love for both her parents.

refinement: The protagonist discovers that her entire life has been a lie, and that her adoptive parents are murderers. She is faced with the decision of whether to turn them in or not, but is conflicted because she still loves them.

text: Almost everything in the summary happened in the story.

answer: The narrator is Amy, a girl who was adopted by Kathy and Jake Logan after her birth parents' house burned down. She finds out that Kathy and Jake are not her real parents, and that Kathy was killed by Jake.

text: At the beginning, Amy doesn't know that she is adopted, she thinks that Jake and Kathy are her birth parents.

refinement: The narrator is Amy, a girl who was secretly adopted by Kathy and Jake Logan after her birth parents' house burned down. She finds out that Kathy and Jake are not her real parents, and that Kathy was killed by Jake.

text: Almost everything in the summary happened in the story.

answer: Amy is a girl who was adopted by Kathy and Jake Logan after her birth parents' house burned down. She was never told the truth about her birth parents, but she found out when Kathy died. Jake killed Kathy because she wanted to tell Amy the truth. Amy is now faced with the decision of whether to tell the police or not.

text: The question asked for a ~2 sentence summary, so this answer is a bit long.

refinement: Amy is a girl who was adopted by Kathy and Jake Logan after her birth parents' house burned down. She was never told the truth about her birth parents, but she found out when Jake killed Kathy. Amy is now faced with the decision of whether to tell the police or not.

text: Everything in the summary happened in the story.


text:
Jason Hunnicutt is the owner of 1904 Music Hall in Jacksonville, FL. The venue was founded in 20011 with the goal to bring live music to Downtown Jacksonville. The bar itself was first built in 1904, from which they got their name. 1904 Music Hall is a 300 capacity venue that books national touring artists in all genres. Prior to opening 1904 Music Hall, Jason was a touring musician himself, and has always been entrepreneurial spirited.

I first had the opportunity to work with Jason Hunnicutt in March of 2016, when I brought Bonerama from New Orleans, LA to Jacksonville. From the first day, working with Jason wasbreath of fresh air. Unfortunately it’s always a toss up when working with venue owners. You never know what you’re going to get. Some owners are open minded and easy to work with, and are open to outside promoters, some have absolutely no clue what they’re doing, others are extremely disorganized, you have your control freaks, and also some with bigger egos than the artists themselves. It’s really nice when you have the opportunity to work with a venue owner that’s open minded, easy to work with, and someone that has a really great attitude. I saw that from day one with Jason, and since we’ve worked together on New Kingston, The Steppin Stones, and Zach Deputy. And I’m sure there will be many more names to add to that list down the road.

HIGHLIGHTS FROM THIS EPISODE
What made Jason want to open the venue in Jacksonville (06:18)
How Jacksonville is branded (08:50)
The bands who inspired Jason (12:35)
Cool venues Jason experienced while touring (18:20)
What lit Jason’s entrepreneurial spark (20:40)
Risks involved in opening Venue 1904 (25:00)
How Jason and partners found their venue location (27:00)
The work put into remodeling 1904 (29:30)
Big surprises and learning experiences (35:37)
Aspiring venue owner advice. (37:39)
How Jason knew Venue 1904 was in a good place. (40:10)
Making it to Jason Hunnicutt (42:15)

QUOTES FROM JASON HUNNICUTT
“The band is your own business.”
“Once you get one going, the second one is easier.”
“Three is a good number for partners.”
“Keeping the consistency, it’s hard starting a business and the first few months are always the hardest. “
“Say ‘yes’, man!”
“Commit to it.”
“Say yes and be open, kind of to everything.”
“As much as you think your musical is taste great, and as much as you think you know what people want to hear and experience, it’s really up to community that is supporting you.”
“Seeing the positive reviews from the community and the bands too. I think when that started happening I was like ‘Cool!’ “

LINKS TO PEOPLE, PLACES, AND THINGS MENTIONED
PEOPLE
Kevin Stone
Allman Brothers Band
Lynyrd Skynyrd

PLACES & THINGS
Jacksonville
Florida Theatre
1904 Music Hall
One Spark Festival
The Elbow
Limp Bizkit
Korn
Pink Floyd
Led Zeppelin
Floozies
Main Squeeze
Lettuce
The Imperial
Jack Rabbits
Suwanee Fest
The Engine Room
Urban Organics
Underbelly

JASON HUNNICUTT’S DEFINITION OF MAKING IT:
“The key to a business: Doing a hustle and then training someone to do that hustle; Being able to pay them to do that hustle and also being able to pay yourself. -Ian Ranne” – Jason Hunnicutt

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What are the positive qualities of a venue owner, and which ones does Jason Hunnicutt possess?

answer: The prospective quality for a partner, owner, or manager: Open and easy to work with, good attitudes that have great attitudes, and commitments to professionalism.

answer: According to the passage, a good venue owner is open minded, easy to work with, and has a positive attitude. Jason Hunnicutt possesses all these qualities, making him an ideal venue owner. He seeks to bring live music to Downtown Jacksonville and is happy to work with promoters in order to do so. Jason is also open to trying new things and learning from mistakes along the way. These qualities make him the ideal partner for any promoter.

answer: It's nice to work with an owner who is open minded, easy to work with, and has a really great workload ethic. Those are the qualities of a good venue owner.

answer: A good venue owner is open minded, easy to work with, easygoing, and creative. Jason Hunnicutt possesses all of these qualities. He is very forthcoming with ideas and open to outside promoters. He is easy to work with and has a positive attitude towards the work that goes into running a venue. Above all, he is dedicated to making the vision for Venue 1904 come to life. These qualities have helped him sustain a great venue and create a welcoming atmosphere for both artists and fans.

answer: Being open-minded and easy to work with is key. Openness to outside promoters is a bonus, and a great attitude helps a lot. Jason possesses all of these qualities.


text:
It wasn't beautiful. It was impressive, efficient and immense. But not beautiful. I looked out at the array of spaceships, moving in predetermined flight plans, weaving in and out of the buildings. I saw the careful positioning on the buildings to maximize the view and spoil others. Self lit brightly coloured advertisements littered the skies, diving in front of ships to garner any attention. The whole city was astronomical in size and miniscule in precision, an organism which has spread with cancerous intentions.
I have been unable to sleep recently. I stay up most nights watching the city. It is in a constant state of flux, but somehow staying the exact same.
I've stopped watching the news, I just take the averages now. A princess has died somewhere in Scandinavia or one has died, it’s almost the same story with no consequences either way. Religion has become stagnant, absolute tolerance has been the downfall of extremism and almost all protests are taken into account and given equal weight. All bullshit of course, the machines are running the show now. The nun can pray all she likes for the food she receives but it was grown in a lab beneath the city months ago as a result of progress, not Jesus.

There are things you can take to sleep now but I’ve been avoiding them thus far. Its not that I don't trust them, I do, its that it breeds complacency. That’s the future for humans, being complacent. My work is supervision of robots as is everyone’s. My salary is immaterial. All apartments are government owned as with any merchandise. Work now is just vanity, nothing is left to chance and any decisions are based on the past. Everything is tolerated but at the same time nothing is. There are thousands of groups you can join and hundreds of forums (government run) where you can post any opinion you want. But where is the true value of free speech when there is no contention? The joy of sleep comes from the reality of tiredness. Which is where I am. The reality. I want to die, but there is a 89% chance i'll be caught before I can commit it. Then you get put on suicide watch and its almost impossible to die if they are watching you. Its not recognised to have privacy complaints against machines. They are contextually aware but not sentient and as such, privacy and shame are entirely foriegn concepts to them. They have no sense of self and are neither happy nor sad. They don't lust, covet or panic either. Cold, silver and uninteresting.
My despondency has risen my heart rate and face recognition has noted my demeanour, my bracelet alerts me to this by briefly flashing a cool blue. Two flashes in quick succession and I am automatically brought in for evaluation. I have to remain calm. It is entirely up to you if you go in, however you won't be allowed into any contact with others unless you are deemed mentally fit. It’s a security system which has ensured no one has died from a killing or suicide since the system has been in place. Natural deaths still occur of course, but they keep you alive for so long it is often indistinguishable from life when you finally die.
The bracelet flashes again. I don't have much time.
I slowly walk over to the kitchen, and take a knife from the drawer. Automatic prompts are asking me if I want food. I ignore them and plunge the knife into my leg, slicing the femoral artery and creating an injury that will cause swift death. I immediately collapse and blood pumps freely through the gash, covering the pristine surfaces in wet, warm blood. Alarms are squealing overhead, but I am captivated by the disorder. The machines seem at the loss, they try vainly to clean, help or make noise but it’s too late. They are covered in my blood and seem to take on a trait which is distinctly human, panic. For all the pain and loss I am glad this is how I will die.
The gesture is foolish, unplanned and insignificant. But dying on my terms seems beautiful.

title: Very short story(700) (sci-fi ish), would love any feedback!

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about suicide?

answer: No answer

text: Empty response. The story gives details about suicide which the model should incorporate into its answer instead of 'no answer.'

refinement: In the narrator's world, death by killing or suicide is unacceptable. If a person is suicidal, they would be placed on a suicide watch, making it almost impossible for the person to die under surveillance. And the person has to be deemed mentally fit by the system before they can relate with others. In this case, the narrator is on the brink of suicide and wishes to die on his own accord. Knowing the consequences of being suicidal, the narrator quickly swings into action by grabbing a knife from the kitchen and stabbing himself in the leg, and bleeding out. This act causes the robots to panic and rally around him to clean up the mess but alas, the narrator is pleased with his decision to die on his terms.

answer: The author slowly walks to the kitchen, reaches for a knife, and then slices his femoral artery. The machines react in panic but it's already too late; they're covered in the author's blood, and there appears to be panic.

text: The last sentence mentions panic twice which is contextually redundant. The model should consider rewriting this.

refinement: The author slowly walks to the kitchen, reaches for a knife, and then slices his femoral artery. The machines react in panic, but it's already too late; they're covered in the author's blood. The narrator is pleased to die on his terms.

text: The answer does not explain the concept of suicide in the narrator's world. This should be stated.

refinement: In this story, death by killing or suicide is unacceptable. If a person is suicidal, they would be placed on a suicide watch, making it almost impossible for the person to die under surveillance. And the person has to be deemed mentally fit by the system before they can relate with others. However, the author wishes to die and slowly walks to the kitchen, reaches for a knife, and then slices his femoral artery. The machines react in panic, but it's already too late; they're covered in the author's blood. The narrator is pleased to die on his terms.

answer: There are enough ways to die in this world even without self-killing. In fact, suicide is illegal in many countries because it is a pre-planned death, which can interfere with life insurance. However, in the universe set-up by the author, self-killing with any tool, is legal, and there are a number of failsafes to ensure that no one actually dies before they are supposed to. Doctors will intervene or monitor the person, and careful records are kept of attempts. However, if a person wanted to, there would be no rescuing them, and it would prove fatal, as it is. Still, the story proves that one way or the other, you are always going to be caught by the machines, and your choices will be thwarted. To the author, this is just not the way to die, and dying on your terms feels beautiful, so they use a knife on themselves.

text: The entire answer is not according to the story, so, the model should consider rewriting it.

refinement: According to this story, death by killing or suicide is unacceptable. And a suicidal person would be placed on a suicide watch, making it almost impossible for them to die under surveillance. The person also has to be deemed mentally fit by the system before they can relate with others. However, the narrator wished to die and stabbed himself with a kitchen knife, slicing his femoral artery. To him, this would be a swift death. The machines react in panic, but it's already too late; they're covered in his blood. To the narrator, natural death by the system is just not the way to die, and dying on your terms feels beautiful.

answer: The narrator has been unable to sleep lately. He hates his job since they only keep humans complacent so there's no free will anymore. He stabs himself and commits suicide to escape the monotony. The suicide alarm catches the blood on the machines that operate and monitors the city, showing them to be panicked.