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I was at the bowling alley bar making my rounds as a grown ass man does and was walking out the door when in the reflection I saw a girl walking out behind me. She was cute. I didn’t just hold the door waiting for her to receive the transfer, I straight opened the door, stood post and waited for her to pass. She didn’t thank or even acknowledge me, to which I said, "OK, welcome to life." I began to walk past her because I walk fast as hell when she asked “Excuse me, do you have any change for the bus, I’m just tryi—-“, I interjected: “You know, you didn’t even say thank you when I held the door open for you, let alone mind me at all, maybe next time.”

Beyond that, she seemed like a keeper.

title: Bowling alley bar. (I'm not a writer)

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Where were the narrator and the girl?

answer: At the bowling alley bar.

text: I was at the bowling alley bar

answer: The narrator and girl were at a bowling alley bar.

text: I was at the bowling alley bar

answer: The narrator and the girl were at the bowling alley bar.

text: I was at the bowling alley bar

answer: They both were in the bowling alley.

text: Incomplete answer

refinement: They both were in the bowling alley bar.

answer: In a bowling alley.

text: Incomplete answer

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What did the girl do to annoy the narrator?

answer: She did not say thank you when the narrator held the door open for her.

text: I straight opened the door, stood post and waited for her to pass. She didn’t thank or even acknowledge me,

answer: He didn't acknowledge or thank him when he held the door open for her.

text: I straight opened the door, stood post and waited for her to pass. She didn’t thank or even acknowledge me,

answer: The girl did not thank the narrator when he held the door open for her.

text: I straight opened the door, stood post and waited for her to pass. She didn’t thank or even acknowledge me,

answer: Not thanked when the narrator held the door for her and not acknowledging him when she exited the bowling alley's bus.

text: She wasn't leaving the bus

refinement: Not thanked when the narrator held the door for her and not acknowledging him when she exited the bowling alley's bar.

text: The sentence is clumsy

refinement: She neither thanked nor acknowledged the narrator when he held the door for her.

answer: She didn't thank him.

text: This answer is incomplete

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What did the girl ask from him?

answer: The girl asked him an ine to change for the bus.

text: The answer doesn't make much sense.

refinement: The girl asked him for change for the bus.

answer: The girl asked for change for the bus.

text: she asked “Excuse me, do you have any change for the bus,

answer: The girl asked for change for the bus.

text: she asked “Excuse me, do you have any change for the bus,

answer: Some change for the bus.

text: she asked “Excuse me, do you have any change for the bus,

answer: She asked the boy if he could give her change.

text: The answer is incomplete

refinement: She asked the boy if he could give her change for the bus.

text: she asked “Excuse me, do you have any change for the bus,

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Did he give her the change for the bus?

answer: The man did not give her the change for the bus.

text: I interjected: “You know, you didn’t even say thank you when I held the door open for you, let alone mind me at all, maybe next time.”

answer: No

text: I interjected: “You know, you didn’t even say thank you when I held the door open for you, let alone mind me at all, maybe next time.”

answer: He did not give her the change for the bus.

text: I interjected: “You know, you didn’t even say thank you when I held the door open for you, let alone mind me at all, maybe next time.”

answer: He didn't have it to give her

text: There is no evidence that he didn't have the change to give her

answer: No, he did not and went on his way.

text: I interjected: “You know, you didn’t even say thank you when I held the door open for you, let alone mind me at all, maybe next time.”

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Where was the girl going with the bus?

answer: It was not stated.

answer: It's not clear where she was going but she needed change for the bus.

answer: The girl was heading to catch the bus.

text: This fails to answer the question

answer: Information not found.

answer: She was going to catch the bus to get to wherever she was going.

text: This fails to answer the question

question: Write a ~3 sentence summary.

answer: The narrator walks out of the bowling alley with a cute girl in tow. When she asks for change for the bus, he tells her that he only holds doors for people who thank him, and that he has been minding her. Beyond that, she seemed like a keeper.

text: The middle sentence is inaccurate

refinement: The narrator walks out of the bowling alley with a cute girl in tow. When she asks for change for the bus, he tells her that had neither thanked nor acknowledged him for holding the door and he declined to assist. Beyond that, she seemed like a keeper.

answer: At the bowling alley bar on a typical day, the narrator saw a girl walking out behind him. He held the door for her, but she neither thanked nor acknowledged him. When the girl asked for some change for the bus, the narrator told her that she should be more polite next time. The narrator was impressed by the girl's spirit and chemistry and decided that this was someone worth keeping around.

text: The last sentence is misleading as the narrator had already damaged any chance of building a relationship with the girl.

refinement: At the bowling alley bar on a typical day, the narrator saw a girl walking out behind him. He held the door for her, but she neither thanked nor acknowledged him. When the girl asked for some change for the bus, the narrator told her that she should be more polite next time. Beyond that, she seemed like a keeper.

text: The summary doesn't include the fact the narrator declined her request for change.

refinement: At the bowling alley bar on a typical day, the narrator saw a girl walking out behind him. He held the door for her, but she neither thanked nor acknowledged him. When the girl asked for some change for the bus, the narrator explained that since she'd been so impolite he couldn't assist. Beyond that, she seemed like a keeper.

text: The summary is too long.

refinement: The narrator holds the door for a pretty girl as walks out of a bowling alley bar. She neither thanks nor acknowledges him so when the girl asks for change for the bus, the narrator explains that since she'd been so impolite he can't assist. Beyond that, she seems like a keeper.

answer: At the bowling alley bar, the narrator saw a girl follow him out the door, but instead of politely holding the door open for her, he held it open himself. When she asked for money for the bus, he pointed out she hadn't thanked him. Despite her lack of manners, the narrator found her intriguing and hoped they would bump into each other again.

text: The first sentence makes no sense

refinement: At the bowling alley bar, the narrator holds the door for a girl who neither thanks nor acknowledges him. When she asks for money for the bus, he pointed out she hadn't thanked him. Despite her lack of manners, the narrator found her intriguing and hoped they would bump into each other again.

text: She doesn't ask for money for the bus. She wants change

refinement: At the bowling alley bar, the narrator holds the door for a girl who neither thanks nor acknowledges him. When she asks for change for the bus, he points out she didn't thank him. Despite her lack of manners, the narrator finds her intriguing and hopes they would bump into each other again.

answer: While at a bowling alley, the narrator notices someone walking out of an exit behind him. He looks at her in the reflection, and she is very attractive. She asks if she can be directed to the bus stop, but without saying "thank you" for holding the door for her, or engaging the narrator at all, he rejects her.

text: This is not a good summary and doesn't make a lot of sense.

refinement: The narrator holds the door for a pretty girl as walks out of a bowling alley bar. She neither thanks nor acknowledges him so when the girl asks for change for the bus, the narrator explains that since she'd been so impolite he can't assist. Beyond that, she seems like a keeper.

answer: The narrator held a door for a girl at the bowling alley. She didn't thank him and this annoyed him. When she asked for some change from him, he declined, pointing out to her ignoring him.

text: The summary doesn't allude to how attractive the girl is - an important point.

refinement: The narrator held a door for a cute girl at the bowling alley. She didn't thank him and this annoyed him. When she asked for some change from him, he declined, pointing out to her ignoring him. Beyond that, she seemed like a keeper.

text: The change is for the bus

refinement: The narrator held a door for a cute girl at the bowling alley. She didn't thank him and this annoyed him. When she asked for change for the bus from him, he declined, pointing out to her ignoring him. Beyond that, she seemed like a keeper.

text: The last sentence is clumsy

refinement: The narrator held a door for a cute girl at the bowling alley. She didn't thank him and this annoyed him. When she asked for change for the bus from him, he declined, pointing out how impolite she was.

text: Change to present tense.

refinement: The narrator holds a door for a cute girl at the bowling alley. She doesn't thank him, annoying him. When she asks for change for the bus, he declines, pointing out how impolite she was.


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BROUGHTON HOSPITAL is a psychiatric hospital located in Morganton, North Carolina. It is administered by North Carolina Department of Health and Human Services Division of Mental Health, Developmental Disabilities and Substance Abuse Services.

History

In 1850, influential mental health activist Dorothea Dix petitioned the North Carolina General Assembly to support and build a psychiatric hospital to treat the insane. Within 25 years the General Assembly determined that one hospital was insufficient to care for the population of people afflicted with mental illness. In 1875, the State provided $75,000 for the establishment of a second psychiatric hospital. Built in Morganton on of land, Western Carolina Insane Asylum, opened on March 29, 1883. The asylum admitted physician Dr. Red Pepper as its first patient. By 1884 its first director, Dr. Patrick Livingston Murphy, reported to the General Assembly that more space was needed. In 1885 and 1886 two new wings were opened, expanding the hospital's bed space to over 500 patients.

In 1890 the hospital's name was changed to State Hospital at Morganton, a name it kept until 1959. Patients were used to construct roads on the property, and establish and maintain the gardens and grounds. By 1893 the hospital's holdings would encompass over . During the early 1900s the hospital expanded greatly. Using the colony system, a farm area was established with a dairy, vineyard and greenhouses, all staffed by patients of varying degrees of functionality. The hospital was nearly self-sufficient. Additional expansions and land holdings would take place until just after World War I when public attitudes about mental health patients changed dramatically. The hospital, like many others of this time period, was neglected and suffered during the state and national financial problems of the Great Depression.

During the 1920s, the patient-to-physician ratio was 300-to-1; by the 1930s this was almost 500-to-1. Hours for attendants and nurses were intensive, and time off was sparse. Attendants usually slept in the same wards with patients until further expansion during the 1940s. By that time, the hospital's census topped 3,500 patients. In 1959, State Hospital at Morganton became Broughton Hospital, named after World War II Governor J. Melville Broughton.

The 1960s brought many changes to Broughton: educational programs were established, religious services were incorporated, and the hospital continued to expand (including through affiliated local community health centers). This was part of an effort to de-institutionalize the mentally ill and treat more in local settings. During the 1970s Broughton underwent changes in its housing procedures. Up to that time, its population had been drawn geographically, meaning that patients were being housed according to where they were from, rather than by age or disability. On March 28, 1973, Broughton Hospital received its first survey by the Joint Commission on Accreditation of Healthcare Organizations (JCAHO), and the hospital received a one-year accreditation.

The Broughton Hospital Main Building was designed by architect Samuel Sloan and built in 1877. It was listed on the National Register of Historic Places in 1977 as the WESTERN NORTH CAROLINA INSANE ASYLUM. The BROUGHTON HOSPITAL HISTORIC DISTRICT was listed on the National Register of Historic Places in 1987 and encompasses 60 contributing buildings and one contributing site.[1][2][3]

The period from the 1980s through 1990s was especially difficult for Broughton. Facing increased costs and increased oversight from various organizations, Broughton encountered severe budget problems. In December 1992, the Broughton Hospital Foundation was formed. Its goal was to enhance the lives of the patients at Broughton Hospital through donations, endowments, activities, etc.

Today Broughton serves approximately 800 patients per year and employs approximately 1200 staff members, with a $98 million annual operating budget. In 2011, Broughton began hiring temporary and contract staff to help control overhead costs. Broughton completed a new facility in 2017 that houses the hospital departments and patient divisions under one roof, on the existing grounds. The main building is now preserved as a historical landmark that is used as office space.

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title: Broughton Hospital

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about the history of the name of the Broughton Hospital?

answer: The hospital changed its name from State Hospital at Morganton to Broughton Hospital in 1959.

text: The hospital's first name is omitted.

refinement: Founded as Western Carolina Insane Asylum in 1883, it was renamed to State Hospital at Morganton in 1890. The hospital changed its name from State Hospital at Morganton to Broughton Hospital in 1959.

answer: The hospital is opened in 1883 and it was called Western Carolina Insane Asylum. The name was changed to State Hospital at Morganton in 1890. The name was changed again to Broughton Hospital after  World War II Governor J. Melville Broughton.

text: The year of the final renaming should be mentioned.

refinement: The hospital is opened in 1883 and it was called Western Carolina Insane Asylum. The name was changed to State Hospital at Morganton in 1890. The name was changed again to Broughton Hospital after World War II Governor J. Melville Broughton in 1959.

answer: The hospital's name was changed in 1890 to State Hospital at Morganton. It kept this name until 1959, when it became Broughton.

text: The original name of the hospital is omitted.

refinement: Founded as Western Carolina Insane Asylum in 1883, the hospital's name was changed in 1890 to State Hospital at Morganton. It kept this name until 1959, when it became Broughton.

text: The comma on the last sentence is unnecessary.

refinement: Founded as Western Carolina Insane Asylum in 1883, the hospital's name was changed in 1890 to State Hospital at Morganton. It kept this name until 1959 when it became Broughton.

text: The hospital's final full name should be mentioned.

refinement: Founded as Western Carolina Insane Asylum in 1883, the hospital's name was changed in 1890 to State Hospital at Morganton. It kept this name until 1959 when it became Broughton Hospital.

answer: The hospital was originally called the Western Carolina Insane Asylum until its name was changed to Broughton Hospital in 1959.

text: The answer omits the hospital's name when it was State Hospital at Morganton.

refinement: The hospital was originally called the Western Carolina Insane Asylum until its name was changed to State Hospital at Morganton in 1890 and again to Broughton Hospital in 1959.

answer: In 1890, the hospital's name was changed to State Hospital at Morganton. The asylum became Broughton Hospital in 1959, named after Governor J. Melville Broughton.

text: The hospital's initial name is omitted.

refinement: The Western Carolina Insane Asylum was founded in 1883. In 1890, the hospital's name was changed to State Hospital at Morganton. The asylum became Broughton Hospital in 1959, named after Governor J. Melville Broughton.

text: The hospital is referred to as "asylum" which is somewhat confusing and potentially wrong.

refinement: The Western Carolina Insane Asylum was founded in 1883. In 1890, the hospital's name was changed to State Hospital at Morganton. The hospital became Broughton Hospital in 1959, named after Governor J. Melville Broughton.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about how the capacity of the hospital changed through time?

answer: The hospital expanded often during the 1800s based on census patient fluctuations. Its farming facility increased its self-sufficiency. Winds of change would however see the hospital fall into disrepair many times as patients of this era were not considered medically sane. Number of patients in the system surpassed 3,500 in the early 1900s. Patients sleeping with attendants became a norm. Improvements in 1950s and later in the 2000s saw the facility reduced to a 800 capacity.

text: The answer is wrong on most details, makes up a lot of claims, and is incoherent at places.

text: The answer is empty.

refinement: The article doesn't mention the initial capacity but mentions that it was improved over the next few years to over 500. The article also mentions the hospital growing a lot during the early 1900s, and its census notes about 3500 patients in the 1940s. During modern times, the hospital houses 800 patients per year and employs 1200 staff members.

answer: Two new wings were opened in 1885 and 1886 to expand the hospital's bed space to over 500 patients. It is expanded again by 1940 to 3,500 patients. Today, Broughton serves approximately 800 patients per year.

answer: The capacity of Broughton Hospital has increased gradually over time. It started with only one hospital in 1883, with 500+ beds. By decades later, in the 1970s, the hospital began expecting accreditation from the Joint Commission on Accreditation of Healthcare Organizations. By 2017, Broughton completed a new facility with offices in one location.

text: The accreditation and the new facility are irrelevant.

refinement: The capacity of Broughton Hospital has increased gradually over time. It started with only one hospital in 1883, with 500+ beds.

text: 500+ patient capacity was achieved with the addition of two new buildings. It wasn't the initial capacity.

refinement: The capacity of Broughton Hospital has increased gradually over time. It started with only one hospital in 1883, and the addition of two new buildings in 1885 and 1886 increased capacity to 500+.

text: The answer omits the capacity developments after 1884.

refinement: The capacity of Broughton Hospital has increased gradually over time. It started with only one hospital in 1883, and the addition of two new buildings in 1885 and 1886 increased capacity to 500+. The article mentions the hospital growing a lot during the early 1900s, and its census notes about 3500 patients in the 1940s. During modern times, the hospital houses 800 patients per year and employs 1200 staff members.

answer:
Dorothea Dix was influential in convincing the North Carolina General Assembly to support and build a psychiatric hospital to treat the insane. The establishment of that hospital in 1850 was not enough to support its patient population. This led to the establishment of a second in Morganton that was opened in 1883. However, by 1884, the first director wanted more space. In 1885 and 1886, new wings were added to provide the space needed to support the number of patients.

In 1890, the hospital's name was changed to State Hospital at Morganton. It is not clear what the name change to Broughton Hospital in 1959 did for the patient capacity. Educational facilities were established in the 1960s, religious services were included from the 1960s to the 1990s. The census did not exceed 3,500 by the 1940s.

In 1995, the census was 800-900. In the 2000s, there were 900-1,000 patients in the hospital, and by 2011, there were 1,200.

answer: The article says that the hospital's capacity has drastically changed over time as a result of both increasing costs and increased oversight. Initially, the hospital had 500 patients but by the 1890s this number had skyrocketed to 3,500 patients. In the 1960s the hospital began to change its housing procedures in order to de-institutionalize the mentally ill and treat more in local settings. In the 1980s and 1990s, however, the hospital experienced severe budget problems leading to a reduction in capacity. However, in 2011 the hospital began hiring temporary and contract staff to help control overhead costs. The hospital completed a new facility in 2017 that led to all departments and patient divisions being housed under one roof. The main building is preserved as a historical landmark that is used as office space.


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About

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Inspired by the old masters, Theology, conspiracy theories, and Philosophy, the dark and mysterious have always intrigued Los Angeles based artist Steven Daily. “I’ve always been attracted to the things people don’t want to talk about or acknowledge,” Steven explains. “I guess I paint it as a sort of an art therapy.” Beautiful and moody, Steven’s incredible paintings reveal his talent for perfect blends and inspiring technical skill. Not limited to acrylic or oil paint on canvas, Steven brings large scale murals to life with spray paint.

Steven Daily has lived all over the United States but was born in Riverside, California. Art was a always a part of Steven’s life from an early age, when he began drawing at just 5 years old. Furthering his influence, his mother was an oil painter and painted primarily landscapes. Another bit of guidance came from his crew, Bashers. “Bashers started out of a group of like minded friends, who painted graffiti. My second family,” Steven recounts.

Steven has since gone on to work with some big companies like Disney, Lucas Arts, Sony, Dark Horse Comics, Slave Labor Graphics, and HBO. He is married to a fellow artist which he finds inspiring and helpful. “She’s my worst critic, which pushes the pieces I make that much further.” Also a new Dad, Steven used to think he never wanted to have children but now finds immense joy in it. “It’s life changing. As artists, we tend to be selfish individuals. The unconditional love I have experienced with this little man is unprecedented. The self seems to fall away, and you find yourself living for your child not your career or you. I’ve definitely learned the preciousness of time management, and patience.”

Steven Daily’s giant spray painted jellyfish can be seen stretching along the exterior wall of SILO at 15th and F Street in Makers Quarter. Stay tuned for Steven’s solo show for 2016 “Burn The Boats” at Marcas Gallery in Santa Ana, CA. Steven’s words of advice for emerging talent? “Practice your craft and work hard. Enjoy the journey, don’t concentrate on the destination. You never know where the work will take you!”

Photos and article by Carly Ealey

Art independently curated by Chris Konecki. For more information on art in Makers Quarter™ contact: art@ryanb40.sg-host.com

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What is the inspiration os Steven Daily's murals?

answer: The inspiration for Steven Daily's murals is the dark and mysterious.

answer: The inspiration behind Steven Daily's murals is curiosity about things people don't want to talk or acknowledge.

answer: He explains he is always attracted to the things people don’t want to talk about. He says it is art therapy. It might also be a form of release.

text: 'He says it is art therapy. It might also be a form of release.' is unnecessary.

refinement: He explains he is always attracted to the things people don’t want to talk about.

answer: The conspiracy theories, Theology and Philosophy.

text: 'The' in the answer is unnecessary.

refinement: Conspiracy theories, Theology and Philosophy.

answer: Steven is a large scale muralist who uses spray paint as a method of "art therapy". He believes his greatest inspiration and his biggest draw as a creative are the parts of life people don't want to talk about or acknowledge.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How did Steven get his start as an artist?

answer: 5 years old when he began drawing, he continued this because his mother was an oil painter and one of his crew members was his mom

text: Incorrect information 'and one of his crew members was his mom' should be removed.

refinement: 5 years old when he began drawing, he continued this because his mother was an oil painter .

answer: His mother was an oil painter. Steven says art was always a part of his life from an early age.

text: The answer should be a more direct response based on the text.

refinement: His mother was an oil painter. Steven says he started drawing at the age of 5.

answer: He began to draw at the young age of 5 and initially had guidance and influence from his mother who was an oil painter primarily focused on landscapes. Soon he would go on to join a group of graffiti artists called the "Bashers". The "Bashers" were described by Steven as a second family.

answer: Steven first became an artist at a young age by drawing. He got further inspiration from his crew, Bashers, who were graffiti artists and his mother, who was an oil painter and primarily focused on landscapes.

text: The answer could mention he started drawing at age 5.

refinement: Steven first became an artist at the age of 5. He got further inspiration from his crew, Bashers, who were graffiti artists and his mother, who was an oil painter and primarily focused on landscapes.

text: Order of the answer could better reflect the chronology of his influences. His mother should come before the 'Bashers'

refinement: Steven first became an artist at the age of 5 influenced by his mother, who was an oil painter and primarily focused on landscapes. He got further inspiration from his crew, Bashers, who were graffiti artists.

answer: Steven got his start as an artist from drawing at a young age and through his involvement with the graffiti crew Bashers.

text: Answer should represent the influence of his mother.

refinement: Steven got his start as an artist from drawing at a young age, influenced by is mother and, later, through his involvement with the graffiti crew Bashers.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How has Steven maintained his inspiration as an artist as he aged?

answer: Steven has maintained his inspiration and unique vision due to his wife, who has been a huge influence on his art, and becoming a father.

answer: Steven has always been attracted to the things others don't want to talk about or acknowledge. In order to maintain his inspiration, Steven sees art as an art therapy where he can explore and express subjects that fascinate him. Steven finds that this helps keep him driven and focused on his craft.

text: Whilst it's approximately correct, there is a clearer answer given by the text. This answer counts too much on supposition and could easily be a response to a different question.

refinement: Steven Daily has been influenced by other artists as he has aged, from his mother to 'The Bashers', and now he continues to source inspiration from his wife and being a parent.

answer: Steven has been inspired by everything from conspiracy theories to the old masters to his crew of graffiti artists. Steven approaches his art work as an art therapy and enjoys the journey rather than the destination.

text: The answer should mention his wife as a continued influence.

refinement: Steven has been inspired by everything from conspiracy theories to the old masters to his crew of graffiti artists. Steven approaches his art work as an art therapy and enjoys the journey rather than the destination. DSteven continues to be influenced by his wife and being a parent.

answer: He is married to a fellow artist who encourages him to stretch himself in his craft (making him a better artist) and pushing his pieces to be better.

answer: Despite working for many big names over the years like Disney, George Lucas, Sony, HBO, and more, Steven maintains that his biggest inspiration is his wife, a fellow artist, and also his son. He believes having his biggest critic in his wife and his biggest challenge as an artist in his son has helped him to grow and develop.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What is Steven up to now?

answer: Steven is creating large scale murals with spray paint and has painted large scale pieces for companies like Disney, Lucas Arts, and HBO. He has also recently completed a solo show at Marcas Gallery in Santa Ana.

answer: He is a professional artist and illustrator that has created many large scale murals. He says art is a vehicle for therapy.

text: Answer should mention his upcoming show.

refinement: He is a professional artist and illustrator that has created many large scale murals. He has an upcoming show in Santa Ana, CA. He says art is a vehicle for therapy.

answer: At the time of this article he had an upcoming solo show in 2016 called "Burn The Boats" in Santa Ana, CA, and wanted to remind potential future artists to focus on their craft, enjoy the journey, and let the work guide them in their future.

answer: Steven is currently creating large scale murals with spray paint and preparing for a solo show at Marcas Gallery in Santa Ana.

answer: He currently has several large scale murals in Los Angeles.

text: Answer should mention his upcoming show.

refinement: He currently has several large scale murals in Los Angeles and an upcoming show in Santa Ana, CA.

question: Write a ~5 sentence summary.

answer: Steven Daily is a Los Angeles-based artist whose work focuses on the dark and mysterious. His beautiful, moody paintings reveal his talent for perfect blends and inspiring technical skill. Steven is also an accomplished muralist who has worked with big companies like Disney and Lucas Arts. He enjoys doing art as a form of therapy and is now a father. Steven has some great advice for emerging artists: practice your craft and work hard.

answer: Steven Daily is an artist living in Los Angeles who paints with blends of beautiful colors, mysterious imagery, and deep thought. Inspired by the old masters, conspiracy theories, and philosophy, Steven finds beauty and escape in what people tend to ignore. His work depicts incredible technical skill and perfect blends. Steven will also have a solo show in 2016 at Marcas Gallery and shares advice to emerging artists: practice and enjoy the journey.

answer: Artist Steven Daily does intricate and intricate work. His new kid and a wife inspire him. He has been living all through the United States. His second family is a group of graffiti creators. He believes a person should love the journey and not the destination.

text: General grammatical edit required. Example: 'Artist Steven Daily does intricate and intricate work.'

refinement: Artist Steven Daily creates intricate and intriguing works. He has a variety of influences from his mother to his wife and child. He has lived throughout the United States. His second family is a group of graffiti creators called 'Te Basers'. He believes a person should love the journey and not the destination.

answer: The author of this article is Carly Ealey of Art independantly curated by Chris Konecki and these 5 facts are about the emerging talent - the arts - artist Steven Daily. Steven is a talented artist who has lived all over the States and was born in Riverside, California. He is a gamer, married to a fellow artist, a new Dad and someone who appreciates the good art of great masters. Steven creates beautiful paintings filled with mystery and intrigue in Diego, California using acrylic and oil paint on canvas for large-scale murals and mixing impressive spray paintings. In his words, the professional advice he has for emerging artists is to practice their craft and not worry about the destination and enjoy the journey of working hard to get their art out there.

text: First sentence is unnecessary. 'The author of this article is Carly Ealey of Art independently curated by Chris Konecki and these 5 facts are about the emerging talent - the arts - artist Steven Daily.' can be removed.

refinement: Steven is a talented artist who has lived all over the States and was born in Riverside, California. He is a gamer, married to a fellow artist, a new Dad and someone who appreciates the good art of great masters. Steven creates beautiful paintings filled with mystery and intrigue in Diego, California using acrylic and oil paint on canvas for large-scale murals and mixing impressive spray paintings. In his words, the professional advice he has for emerging artists is to practice their craft and not worry about the destination and enjoy the journey of working hard to get their art out there.

text: Grammatical edit of 'In his words, the professional advice he has for emerging artists is to practice their craft and not worry about the destination and enjoy the journey of working hard to get their art out there.' is necessary.

refinement: Steven is a talented artist who has lived all over the States and was born in Riverside, California. He is a gamer, married to a fellow artist, a new Dad and someone who appreciates the good art of great masters. Steven creates beautiful paintings filled with mystery and intrigue in Diego, California using acrylic and oil paint on canvas for large-scale murals and mixing impressive spray paintings. The advice he has for emerging artists is to practice their craft and to enjoy the journey, not to worry about the destination.

answer: Steven Daily is a large scale muralist who primarily works with spray paint, his edge as an artist coming from his fascination with the things in life people don't like to talk about or acknowledge. He started drawing at age 5 and was influenced early on by his mother, a landscape oil painter, and his graffiti group and "second family", the Bashers. As he aged, he found that despite working for many big names like Disney, George Lucas, HBO, and many more, his biggest inspiration and ongoing motivation are his wife, another artist, and his son. Despite originally not wanting children, and admitting that his wife is his biggest critic, he feels having these challenges so close to him have helped him grow and develop as an artist. Along these lines, he advises potential artists to focus on their craft, enjoy the journey, and most importantly let the work guide their journies.


text:
     It's funny how people act in the coffee rooms at funeral homes. They're all sad or they act sad out of respect. They all drink coffee and eat the cookies that they put out on the table, and they talk about how the body looks for a while, then they start talking about politics or the weather or some damn boring thing. It happens at every viewing I've ever been to. I even do it. I sat there the other night at my great aunts viewing and I nodded my head when people talked about how natural she looked and all that, and I ate three big cookie, then I looked down at my gut and was disgusted because I'm a damn glutton.
	Anyways, two things happened when we all left the funeral home: the first thing was I offered to be a pallbearer. It was my great aunt Margret's viewing, like I said, and my grandma said that me or my brother ought to be pallbearers. My brother's real nervous about some things, one of them is being around dead people. He was afraid he'd drop the casket or something, so I offered to do it, but Margret's niece said no. She told my grandma later that the reason she said no was because I looked like a clown because of my hair. I have long shaggy hair that I dye blood red.
     The second thing is that I noticed the damn Christmas tree in the corner near the door in the lobby -- it's getting close to Christmas now. It was tall and green and decorated in bright white lights and silver tinsel and big red bulbs with the names of all the dead people who were shown there that year written on them with permanent marker. I saw Margret's name in the center.
	I thought it was sort of strange, decorating the tree with the dead. I think that funeral homes are strange altogether. When you die everybody you ever met practically comes and cries and get all sad at the site of your leftover meat.
	When I got back home I started over to my friend Darren's house.
	Darren and I have went to school together since fourth grade, but we just started hanging out this year because we've always ran with different crowds. His friends are the kind of guys that wear gym shorts all year long and lust after Air Jordans and Beats Headphones and try to punk out everybody so they can feel tough. Plus, we've never had any classes together or anything until this year, but Darren's probably my favorite friend.
      The only problem with us hanging out is that he smokes a lot of weed and he's got me smoking a lot too. Last weekend we blew fifteen bucks on weed, smoked it all and stayed up until four listening to The Beatles.
	He's never listened to much music outside of rap, so I've been trying to show him some good stuff. He always acts like he likes it, but he's probably just entertaining me. He's probably just telling me he likes it because we're friends and he's nice. Darren's a real nice sensitive guy under all that wanna-be-thug shit he's always doing. He's nicer than me in a lot of ways, like when he's listening to rap and I don't like it, I tell him and bitch until he turns it off, and when he turns it off, he isn't even mad about having to doing it because he's real considerate. I wish I was that considerate.
	Anyways, Darren and I ended up going down to the cemetery and smoking a fat joint. I told him about the funeral home Christmas tree and he said that the funeral home was retarded.
	"They won't be putting my name on some damn bulb," he said. Then he talked about the rapture through the rest of the cemetery. He told me that we weren't going to have to worry about funerals because we weren't really going to die because we  were going up in the rapture. Darren was always talking about the rapture. He never went to church, but he had all the faith
in the world that the rapture was going to happen at any minute and he had all the faith in the world that the two of us were going.
	He told me once that I'm the only friend he likes to talk to about the rapture. It was probably because I'm the only one
who will even listen. I don't believe in the Bible, but I don't mind talking about Bible stuff if I care about the person doing most of the talking.
	If Heaven exists, Darren will go because he's nice and sensitive. If there's a Heaven, Margret's there because she was a real sweet lady. It's a nice idea, the idea of Heaven, I mean. I guess I'd rather float up to a cloud kingdom than to get old and die and be buried in a boxes.
	Anyways, I'm not sure why he thinks I'm going to Heaven.
	Once we got out of the cemetery, we saw this old tin can in the middle of the street, and the street was empty because it was about nine at night or later and it was cold and everybody besides the two of us were inside around heater and wrap in blankets, probably. Anyways, we started kicking the can down this alley and we kept falling down and laughing because we were stoned.
	We kept on kicking the can down the alleys until I had to piss. I went behind this old white shed, unbuttoned my pants and
unzipped and started pissing. There was this Oldsmobile behind me, it was parked on the other side of the alley, I thought it was empty because it was dark and I couldn't see through the
windows. Well, somebody was in it, and halfway through my piss, whoever it was  beeped the horn and scared me half to death,
 and I ended up pissing down my leg. I zipped up my pants and Darren and I got the hell out of the alley as fast as we could. It was funny, though. I didn't even mind the piss on my leg that much.

title: [UR] Funeral Home Christmas Tree

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about the type of person Darren is?

answer: The story portrays Darren as a sensitive, considerate person. He listens to music his friend finds meaningful, and he is always open to discussing matters of faith and the afterlife. By contrast, the protagonist also recognizes that Darren behaves differently from him: whereas the protagonist is easily irritated, Darren is patient and kind.

answer: Darren is a nice guy who listens to his friend as they share their stories and viewpoints. He's a sensitive guy under all the thug talk, and he's considerate when it comes to his friend's opinions. Darren has all the faith in the world in the rapture, and he believes only those who have a pure heart, such as himself, will make it to heaven. It seems Darren has never tried to go against the temptations he was always exposed to on the streets.

text: The response contains inaccurate information.

refinement: Darren is a nice guy who listens to his friend as they share their stories and viewpoints. He's a sensitive guy under all the thug talk, and he's considerate when it comes to his friend's opinions. Darren has all the faith in the world in the rapture, and he believes only those who have a pure heart, such as himself, will make it to heaven. Darren also smokes a lot of weed.

answer: Darren is a kind guy who is sensitive and considerate. He enjoys cannabis and would talk about the rapture. He lacks faith in the church and has strong faith in the Bible and in the rapture.

answer: The story suggests that Darren is a considerate and sensitive person. Despite being of a different crowd and listening to different music, Darren is able to show compassion for others, even in times of hardship. Darren also sees the absurdity in the funeral home Christmas tree, and the two spend time having fun in the cemetery. It is clear that Darren is a kind, sweet person.

answer: Darren smokes a lot of weed. He pretends to like the narrator's music because they're friends and he's nice. He's a sensitive guy under his wannabe-thug persona. He turns off his rap music when the narrator says he doesn't like it, and isn't mad about it because he's considerate. He's always talking about the rapture, even though he never goes to church. The narrator believes that if Heaven exists, Darren would go.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize everything relating to the narrator's family.

answer: The narrator attends the viewing for his great aunt Margret. His grandma said that he or his broughter ought to be pall bearers. Since his brother was afraid of dropping the casket, the narrator offered to do it, but Margret's niece declined. The narrator believes Margret is in Heaven because she was a real sweet lady.

text: The response contains a typo.

refinement: The narrator attends the viewing for his great aunt Margret. His grandma said that he or his brother should be a pall bearer. Since his brother was afraid of dropping the casket, the narrator offered to do it, but Margret's niece declined. The narrator believes Margret is in Heaven because she was a real sweet lady.

answer: The narrator is related to Margret. He seems to live with their grandmother and brother. Their father lives separately, not being mentioned in this text.

text: The response contains baseless conjecture.

refinement: The narrator is related to Margret. He seems to live with their grandmother and brother. Their father is not mentioned in the text.

text: The response could contain more detail.

refinement: The narrator is related to their great aunt Margret. He seems to live with their grandmother and brother. Their father is not mentioned in the text.

answer: The narrator's great aunt Margret died, and at her viewing the narrator volunteered to be a pallbearer. There was also a Christmas tree set up in the lobby of the funeral home with names of dead people written on the bulbs. The narrator and Darren went down to the cemetery to smoke a joint, and the oldsmobile parked there scared the narrator while he was urinating. The narrator's family seems to consist mostly of relatives who have passed away.

text: The response contains lots of irrelevant information.

refinement: The narrator's great aunt Margret died, and at her viewing the narrator volunteered to be a pallbearer. The narrator's family seems to consist mostly of relatives who have passed away.

text: The response contains inaccurate information.

refinement: The narrator's great aunt Margret died, and at her viewing the narrator volunteered to be a pallbearer. The narrator also has a brother and a grandmother.

answer: The narrator's grandma says she says either him or his brother ought to be pallbearers at her great aunt Margret's viewing. They went to the cemetery together to smoke pot and talk about the rapture where the narrator starts kicking a tin can. His friend Darren kept talking about the rapture and they kept talking until they got back and they got in the Olds near the white shed.

text: The response contains lots of irrelevant information.

refinement: The narrator's grandma says she says either him or his brother ought to be pallbearers at her great aunt Margret's viewing.

answer:
The narrator's great aunt Margret died, and the viewer attendees discussed the body and other mundane topics. The narrator then noticed the funeral home's Christmas tree and found the decorations morbid and strange.

The narrator's family consists of the narrator and their brother, as well as their great aunt Margret. The family is predominantly composed of older people and the narrator's brother is nervous around dead people. Though the narrator considers himself nice, Darren is even nicer. The narrator and Darren got stoned and observed a tin can in the street, and the narrator eventually urinated against a white shed, which caused someone to honk their car horn and scare the narrator. The narrator does not mind the resulting urine on their leg, which is indicative of their generally good-hearted nature.

text: The response contains lots of irrelevant information.

refinement: The narrator's great aunt Margret died, and the viewer attendees discussed the body and other mundane topics. The narrator's family consists of the narrator and their brother, as well as their great aunt Margret. The family is predominantly composed of older people and the narrator's brother is nervous around dead people.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the narrator's movements after he meets up with Darren.

answer: After meeting up with his friend Darren, the narrator goes to the cemetery and smokes a joint, then goes for a walk afterward. While walking, the narrator finds a tin can in the street, and as he is peeing behind an empty car, the car's horn is accidentally blown, causing him to piss on himself.

answer: After the narrator and Darren meet, they meet up with his friend at the cemetery to smoke a joint. They walk a bit and when they leave the cemetery, go to kick a tin can back to Darren's place until the narrator needs to go to the bathroom.

text: The response contains inaccurate information.

refinement: After the narrator and Darren meet, they go to the cemetery to smoke a joint. They walk a bit and when they leave the cemetery, go to kick a tin can back to Darren's place until the narrator needs to go to the bathroom.

text: The response leaves out some information.

refinement: After the narrator and Darren meet, they go to the cemetery to smoke a joint. They walk a bit and when they leave the cemetery, go to kick a tin can back to Darren's place until the narrator needs to go to the bathroom. The narrator left to use the bathroom and got honked at.

answer: The narrator meets with Darren at Darren's house. They go to the cemetery. Once they exit the cemetery, they kick a can down an alley. The narrator goes behind an old white shed to pee. When the narrator realizes there is someone in the car parked on the other side of the alley, he and Darren run away as fast as they can.

text: The response leaves out some information.

refinement: The narrator meets with Darren at Darren's house. They go to the cemetery. Once they exit the cemetery, they kick a can down an alley. The narrator goes behind an old white shed to pee. A car on the other side of the alley honks, and he and Darren run away as fast as they can.

answer: The narrator went to Darren's house and smoked a joint together. While walking back from the cemetery, the narrator sees a funeral home Christmas tree and is disturbed by it. After kicking a tin can around an alley, the narrator ends up pissing down his leg when a car honks at him. Despite the pee, the narrator doesn't mind too much.

text: The response contains inaccurate information.

refinement: The narrator went to Darren's house and then the cemetery and smoked a joint together. After kicking a tin can around an alley, the narrator ends up pissing down his leg when a car honks at him. Despite the pee, the narrator doesn't mind too much.

answer: The two go to a cemetery directly after visiting the funeral home and smoking a joint. Darren convinces the narrator that his drug-use and bad behavior "isn't that bad" while encouraging him to follow in those footsteps. After visiting the cemetery, the two hang out kicking a tin can until the narrator pisses and causes it to fall, causing the narrator to pee himself.

text: The response contains inaccurate information.

refinement: The two go to a cemetery and smoke a joint. Darren convinces the narrator that his drug-use and bad behavior "isn't that bad" while encouraging him to follow in those footsteps. After visiting the cemetery, the two hang out kicking a tin can until the narrator needs to pee. A car honks at him, causing the narrator to pee himself.


text:
I’ve always tried my best.  Unfortunately my best never seems to be  good enough.  Story of my life.  Another job interview, another rejection.  What do they want?   Some kind of superhuman?  Who can do everything better than anyone for half the pay?  Since when does an entry level job involve five years experience?  Fucking ridiculous is what it is!  Taking advantage of the wee man because they know they can get away with it, taking skilled workers down on their luck who need to work but offering them shoddy wages.  “we’re in a recession you know”, they say, and damn happy they are about it too the fuckers.  A prime opportunity to fuck the average worker out of full wages.  Five years experience for an entry level job?  Pah!  Maybe the bankers did it on purpose to keep the little man in his place.

This time though, the interview was doomed from the start.  From the moment I walked in I knew it.  There were three of them.  All sat behind a desk in raised chairs and immaculate suits, I swear I could smell the smarminess oozing off of them.  You know the type, the sense of entitlement, the little private smiles as they look down on you in the purposely chosen shitty chair to automatically deny you any psychological edge.  They want you down there, looking up at them pleading for a job, it helps their egos to know that they have this power over you, the power to give you a leg up.  A way back in.  Part of the team buddy.

I hate them.

Like I said, there was three of them sat there, with the big boss in the middle.  He hasn’t even looked up as I’ve came in and sat in the only chair, I’m kept waiting, looking like a douche as I wait because I don’t want to stop smiling until I’ve at least made eye contact.  Finally, he looks up, still not saying anything as he examines me like a side a beef in a butcher shop.
Boss:  “Mr Carrick, I’ll cut to the chase.  I’ve pretty much made up my mind who I want for this job but figure I have to go through with the rest of this charade now it’s started.  So, you have 2 minutes to convince me why I should disregard my choice and choose you.”

What the fuck?

I mean, what the actual fuck?  This isn’t how it works.  He’s meant to ask me standard but mundane questions about my background, give me scenarios and ask what I’d do if put in a certain situation where I can answer with the same bullshit as everyone else and add buzz words like team player, responsible, enthusiastic and all that shite.  This isn’t how it works.

All this goes through my head in a split second as I try not to get all flustered.  I’m fucked.  I haven’t prepared for this scenario and in realising this I can’t help but see the genius in it.  Whether he’s telling the truth or not doesn’t matter, this is a test, a proper test to see how I react under pressure.  Touché old man, touché.
Me:  “I must admit, I definitely was not prepared for that.  I appreciate the honesty and with that in mind rather than tell you why you should disregard your choice for me, I’ll tell you why you shouldn’t.
Now, I’m unemployed at the moment and need to get back to work.  I’ve been for many interviews and after today will go for many more.  I have no particular desire to work for you and your company, no burning passion or shared vision or all that other crap people will have been telling you all day.  I just need a job and you have a vacancy in a field in which I’m capable, not only am I capable, I’m damn fucking good.  I like what I do and I do it well.  I lost my previous job due to “downsizing” and since then have met lots of people in the same position.  If I want to go back to work I have to take a major pay cut for doing more work just for the privilege of working.

I am willing to take that hit.

A job for me is something which helps sustain my lifestyle, my job is not my lifestyle.  I enjoy it but that’s not the point I’m making.  To be perfectly frank, and I’m sorry if I offend you but, I am sick and tired of this whole charade.  Interview after interview, being judged on whether I’m the right sort, the right fit for the company.  I’m already at a disadvantage, there are three of you and one of me, you are behind a desk and on raised chairs to give the impression of seniority.  What chance do I have when you have all the power?  You tell me you’ve made your choice, that’s great, why the hell am I here then?  All you’ll have is somebody who can excel in this environment better, maybe a better CV or better experience but I can guarantee that they are the same as me.  Somebody who just needs the work.  Now I could never promise that I’d be the best damn appointment you ever make but I can tell you that if you do go with me, and are fair with me, then I will do the job to the best of my ability.  I will work to deadlines and go that extra mile if I feel it’s warranted but what I won’t do is give up my life for you, become a slave to the wage so you can make a profit.  Be fair with me and treat me like a real person and I will do whatever is asked, treat me like an autobot and you can shove the job up your arse.

Been great talking at you, I’ll see myself out.”

So, that’s another potential employer I can score off the list.  Fuck sake, it’s getting quite desperate.  Maybe have to bite the bullet and take a bar job or, god forbid, a call centre job.  Fuck.  Four years out of university and already been made redundant, after purposely getting a sensible degree in computing.  “computers are the future” they said, “always be work in that industry”.  Just a pity everybody else had the same idea.  Maybe should have fucked off abroad after getting laid off, blown it all on cocktails and exotic girls.

Fuck it, time to get drunk.

title: Time to get drunk.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What sorts of things does this passage reveal about its author on a deeper level?

answer: The author is obviously exhausted, but one could deduce that maybe their fatigue comes from other factors in their life as well. They seem to have a distrust of authority and the system, which may come from personal run-ins, or could come from a lifetime of lacking privilege. The author has clearly fought a lot throughout their life, which makes one think they never had it easy.

answer: This passage reveals that the author is frustrated, cynical, and spiteful. The author deeply resents being disadvantaged in the job interview process, and would rather be unemployed than accept unfair limitations and poor treatment. The author has a pessimistic view of the world, predicting that all other job candidates are less qualified and less qualified than they are. The author also has a black and white view of the world, seeing things only in extremes with no shades of gray. This sense of entitlement and misplaced arrogance leads to a pervasive negativity and despair. The author is bitter, feeling that the system is rigged against them and everyone else in their position. Despite their level of skill and experience, the author feels powerless and invalidated in the face of power and privilege.

text: The author says others would be just like him, capable people who just need the work. He doesn't predict he's better than everyone else.

refinement: This passage reveals that the author is frustrated, cynical, and spiteful. The author deeply resents being disadvantaged in the job interview process, and would rather be unemployed than accept unfair limitations and poor treatment. The author has a pessimistic view of the world. The author also has a black and white view of the world, seeing things only in extremes with no shades of gray. This sense of entitlement and misplaced arrogance leads to a pervasive negativity and despair. The author is bitter, feeling that the system is rigged against them and everyone else in their position. Despite their level of skill and experience, the author feels powerless and invalidated in the face of power and privilege.

text: The assertion that the author sees the world in black and white is unattested.

refinement: This passage reveals that the author is frustrated, cynical, and spiteful. The author deeply resents being disadvantaged in the job interview process, and would rather be unemployed than accept unfair limitations and poor treatment. The author has a pessimistic view of the world. This sense of entitlement and misplaced arrogance leads to a pervasive negativity and despair. The author is bitter, feeling that the system is rigged against them and everyone else in their position. Despite their level of skill and experience, the author feels powerless and invalidated in the face of power and privilege.

text: The author doesn't seem entitled at all, wanting only decent treatment in exchange for doing good work.

refinement: This passage reveals that the author is frustrated, cynical, and spiteful. The author deeply resents being disadvantaged in the job interview process, and would rather be unemployed than accept unfair limitations and poor treatment. The author has a pessimistic view of the world. The author is bitter, feeling that the system is rigged against them and everyone else in their position. Despite their level of skill and experience, the author feels powerless and invalidated in the face of power and privilege.

text: The author doesn't seem spiteful.

refinement: This passage reveals that the author is frustrated and cynical. The author deeply resents being disadvantaged in the job interview process, and would rather be unemployed than accept unfair limitations and poor treatment. The author has a pessimistic view of the world. The author is bitter, feeling that the system is rigged against them and everyone else in their position. Despite their level of skill and experience, the author feels powerless and invalidated in the face of power and privilege.

answer: That they have had to endure a lot of trouble finding a job that fits their needs, which drives them to have a not always optimistic outlook on the search. They seem driven but not necessarily confident, which makes them a little vulnerable. They are willing to work hard but they are not willing to give up as-many-things-as-possible for their job, which could be used as a shorthand description of their personality.

answer: The author is frustrated due to constant rejections in trying to find a job. This frustration has culminated in a profound distrust and resentment for those that possess power over him. Despite being outwardly intelligent and capable, the author does not have a steadfast or unwavering belief in himself. He is constantly looking for an advantage to provide assurance that he can excel and get ahead. He does not have the typical expectation of hiring and interviewing practices, and feels like he is fighting an uphill battle. He is also sarcastic which reveals a dark sense of humor. Overall, the author appears to be self-conscious and weary, with low self-confidence.

text: The author doesn't seem to be seeking an advantage.

refinement: The author is frustrated due to constant rejections in trying to find a job. This frustration has culminated in a profound distrust and resentment for those that possess power over him. Despite being outwardly intelligent and capable, the author does not have a steadfast or unwavering belief in himself. He does not have the typical expectation of hiring and interviewing practices, and feels like he is fighting an uphill battle. He is also sarcastic which reveals a dark sense of humor. Overall, the author appears to be self-conscious and weary, with low self-confidence.

text: The author knows the typical hiring process and expects it. He's surprised when he doesn't find it.

refinement: The author is frustrated due to constant rejections in trying to find a job. This frustration has culminated in a profound distrust and resentment for those that possess power over him. Despite being outwardly intelligent and capable, the author does not have a steadfast or unwavering belief in himself. He feels like he is fighting an uphill battle. He is also sarcastic which reveals a dark sense of humor. Overall, the author appears to be self-conscious and weary, with low self-confidence.

text: The text doesn't include much sarcasm if any.

refinement: The author is frustrated due to constant rejections in trying to find a job. This frustration has culminated in a profound distrust and resentment for those that possess power over him. Despite being outwardly intelligent and capable, the author does not have a steadfast or unwavering belief in himself. He feels like he is fighting an uphill battle. Overall, the author appears to be self-conscious and weary, with low self-confidence.

answer: It's clear from their response to this supposed job interview that they have a strong antipathy for authority and other generic establishments alleged to exploit hard work for the benefit of a few, as well as a reluctance to sell themselves in giving a genuine sense of servitude or devotion to any actual idea of a cohesive establishment. Ultimately, they seem someone who simply needs to a way to pay their bills, but has a strong independent streak.

text: The first sentence is too long and confusing. It should state that the author has a negative opinion about authority and power, and he doesn't want to be exploited.

refinement: The author has strong antipathy toward authority and power. He clearly expresses that he won't tolerate being exploited, but he's ready to give his best to do his job well. Ultimately, they seem someone who simply needs to a way to pay their bills, but has a strong independent streak.

text: The last sentence has a few grammar issues. It should say "...he seems to be someone..." and "...needs a way to pay the bills with a strong..."

refinement: The author has strong antipathy toward authority and power. He clearly expresses that he won't tolerate being exploited, but he's ready to give his best to do his job well. Ultimately, he seems to be someone who simply needs a way to pay the bills with a strong independent streak.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What might the interviewee, Mr Carrick, have done in the situation with the boss to sway him?

answer: Verbally highlighting their successes, qualities, skills and capabilities will help get the boss to be impressed by them. Highlighting their resumes is only the first step to successful interview, the second being performance.

answer: It's easy to say what one might have done when you are not the one exasperated and worn down, but there are a couple approaches that Mr Carrick might have taken if he took a step back. He could have made a joke about it, though that is not a guarantee that he would secure the job. It might have made things more pleasant. Mr Carrick also could have been confident in stating his qualifications and the assets he would bring to the company. Mostly, if Mr Carrick had wanted the job, he should not have said he was applying out of desperation.

answer: Mr Carrick likely did his best to convince the boss to give him the job by talking about his experience and skills, explaining that he is very capable but also that he is very determined in work. He also likely stressed that he just needs a job to support himself and that he is not interested in a given company having any special advantage over him. He likely emphasized that he is willing to work hard and do what is asked but he is not someone who will simply accept being mistreated or under-compensated.

text: The answer mentions the things he did, not the things he should've done or not done.

refinement: Mr Carrick likely did his best to convince the boss to give him the job by talking about his experience and skills, explaining that he is very capable but also that he is very determined in work. He stressed that he just needs a job to support himself and that he is not interested to give them any special advantage over him. He likely should've emphasized that he is willing to work hard and do what is asked, instead.

answer: He could have better portrayed him as a valuable asset to their company, someone who will do their best to get their work done.

text: "Him" should be "himself"

refinement: He could have better portrayed himself as a valuable asset to their company, someone who will do their best to get their work done.

answer: Mr Carrick might try to be humble and let the boss know that he has nothing to lose if he hires him. He might stress that he is a hard worker who is eager to do whatever is asked of him. If possible, he might also make strong arguments related to his qualifications and experience that would make him a viable solution to the vacancy. In the end, Mr Carrick likely wants to emphasize his value and show the boss that he is worth considering.


text:
March 2021-

The MC just finished summarizing the operation,
calling it "The most successful infantry op of the 21st century"

     I'm the only man in the ballroom not wearing the Army Service Uniform.
It's a small gathering, just a platoon, a small platoon of thrity men or so.
The only reason why I was here is because of my job. I'm the MI liason for
the CIA, providing key information to SF and Infantry units. I provided the
information on this op, and I know now that I'll live to forget it.

      There was a silence, then a young corporal stood up and spoke.

"To Lieutenant Morton! For his leadership got the job done, and kept us alive!
To John!"

The audience followed suit. "To John!"

I raised my glass half-heartedly, knowing that I have ruined that man's life forever.
The festivities began, and I stood up. I walked towards the officer's table. He was
surrounded by his family, and the family of his late Platoon Sergeant. It's been almost fifteen
years since I've seen John. He was my best friend through Junior high and high school years.
I haven't spoken with him since we left for college.

I got medically declined  my third year of ROTC in college. He was commissioned top of his
class at West Point, class of 2019.  So I got a job at the CIA, serving and working as close
to the army as I could, working as a mission spook. In a way, we were doing the same job,
except I made two hundred thousand dollars a year versus his fifty-three.

I tapped his shoulder.

"John? John Morton?" I asked in confirmation of his name.

"Yes" He replied.

John didn't look like he was in his twenties at all. He had a long, jagged scar across his face,
and mutliple pale patches of skin on his right hand, making the skin grafts noticable. His left
hand, there was no left hand. A metal plastic prosthetic replaced his missing flesh.

"Who are you?"  He asked, looking at my face intently, like I looked familiar.

"I'm Matthew Magee, the spook." Smiling afterwards.

John excused himself from the table and walked with me to an empty table.

"Matt! Damn! It's been years since we've talked. What's going on?"

The man who had once been my best friend in school at been shot at, blasted at,
and gave his right hand for his country, yet he was still lively and friendly as he
was in school. My eyes watered as we talked about our lives. The family, the army life,
spook life, and eventually the mission that we had just taken part of.  There was a
brief pause in the conversation. He then spoke.

"Thanks for the info you gave us. You got most of us out of there alive--"

A tear rolled down my eye.
He stopped talking and asked me what was wrong.
I pointed to his prosthetic. I blinked back my tears and cleared my throat.
"John, the mines...." I paused. "I knew about them. I tried to tell your Platoon
Sergeant, but I was cut off by radio security procedures. Then the mines went off."

He put his left hand on my shoulder. He and shared tears that only combat veterans
can share. Serving the country, the guilt of alternative service.

title: The Guilt of Alternative Service

question: Who is the gathering celebrating?

answer: Lieutenant Morton.

text: "To Lieutenant Morton! For his leadership got the job done, and kept us alive!"

answer: The gathering is celebrating Lieutenant Morton.

text: "To Lieutenant Morton! For his leadership got the job done, and kept us alive!"

answer: The gathering is celebrating Lieutenant John Morton, who led his platoon to victory in a recent military operation.

text: "To Lieutenant Morton! For his leadership got the job done, and kept us alive!"

answer: Lieutenant John Morton who just led an infantry operation as as a member of the US Army.

text: "To Lieutenant Morton! For his leadership got the job done, and kept us alive!"

question: Why is Matthew Magee feeling guilty?

answer: Matthew Magee is feeling guilty because he knows that he is responsible for the death of John Morton's Platoon Sergeant.

text: There are several reasons Magee feels guilty. He feels guilty because he and John have similar jobs, but Magee gets paid nearly five times that of John's salary. He also feels guilty because he knew about the mines that caused John to lose his hand. He feels he didn't do his job well enough.

refinement: Matthew Magee is feeling guilty because he knows that he is responsible for the death of John Morton's Platoon Sergeant. He feels guilty because he and John have similar jobs, but Magee gets paid nearly five times that of John's salary. He also feels guilty because he knew about the mines that caused John to lose his hand. He feels he didn't do his job well enough.

answer: Matthew Magee feels guilty because he knows that he was responsible for the death of John Morton's Platoon Sergeant during the operation they just took part in. He knew about the mines that were in the area, but was unable to warn the Platoon Sergeant in time.

text: He feels guilty because he and John have similar jobs, but Magee gets paid nearly five times that of John's salary. He also feels guilty because he knew about the mines that caused John to lose his hand. He feels he didn't do his job well enough.

refinement: Matthew Magee feels guilty because he knows that he was responsible for the death of John Morton's Platoon Sergeant during the operation they just took part in. He feels guilty because he and John have similar jobs, but Magee gets paid nearly five times that of John's salary. He also feels guilty because he knew about the mines that caused John to lose his hand. He feels he didn't do his job well enough.

answer: He knows about the mines that killed John's platoon sergeant and John's hand.

text: Add "caused the loss of" before "John's hand".

refinement: He knows about the mines that killed John's platoon sergeant and  caused the loss of John's hand.

text: It's omitted that Magee  also feels guilty because he and John have similar jobs, but Magee gets paid nearly five times that of John's salary.

refinement: He knows about the mines that killed John's platoon sergeant and  caused the loss of John's hand. He also feels guilty because he and John have similar jobs, but Magee gets paid nearly five times that of John's salary.

answer: He is an old high school buddy of John's, and was medically declined for his third year of ROTC while John was top of his class. Magee went on to work for the CIA making over $200k per year while John risked his life and made $53k per year. He tried to tell John's platoon about the hidden mines in the operation which caused John to lose his left hand, but the radio got cut off.

text: It's omitted that Magee knows that he is responsible for the death of John Morton's Platoon Sergeant.

refinement: He is an old high school buddy of John's, and was medically declined for his third year of ROTC while John was top of his class. Magee went on to work for the CIA making over $200k per year while John risked his life and made $53k per year. He tried to tell John's platoon about the hidden mines in the operation which caused John to lose his left hand, but the radio got cut off. He also knows that he is responsible for the death of John's Platoon Sergeant.

question: How does John look to Magee now?

answer: John looks like he has aged significantly since they last saw each other. He has a long, jagged scar across his face, and mutliple pale patches of skin on his right hand, making the skin grafts noticable. His left hand, there was no left hand. A metal plastic prosthetic replaced his missing flesh.

answer: John looks older than his years. He has a long, jagged scar across his face, and multiple pale patches of skin on his right hand, making the skin grafts noticable. His left hand, there is no left hand. A metal plastic prosthetic replaced his missing flesh.

answer: Despite being in his twenties, John doesn't look it. He has a jagged scar on his face, skin grafts on his right hand, and he is missing his left hand altogether. He's aged rapidly due to the costs of war, yet still seems to Magee to be as friendly as he was in school.

answer: John looks like a man who has been through hell and back. He has scars and marks all over his body, and he is missing a hand. He seems to be doing well despite all of this, but Magee can see the pain in his eyes.

text: It's not quite accurate to say John is doing well despite everything. It's only mentioned that he is still friendly.

refinement: John looks like a man who has been through hell and back. He has scars and marks all over his body, and he is missing a hand. He is still as friendly as he used to be despite all of this, but Magee can see the pain in his eyes.

text: There is no mention of pain in John's eyes, so that should be omitted even though it's not necessarily false.

refinement: John looks like a man who has been through hell and back. He has scars and marks all over his body, and he is missing a hand. He is still as friendly as he used to be despite all of this.

question: How do John and Matthew reconcile the incident?

answer: Matthew tells John about his knowledge of the mines and his attempt to alert the platoon. He is upset that John lost a hand, and he and John shed tears together that only can be shared by combat veterans who know the costs of war.

answer: John and Matthew reconcile the incident by sharing tears that only combat veterans can share.

answer: John puts his hand on Matthew's shoulder and they share tears.

answer: John and Matthew reconcile the incident by sharing tears and talking about the incident. John understands that Matthew couldn't have done anything to prevent the mines from going off, and Matthew understands that John was doing his duty and that he was successful in completing the mission.

text: "Matthew understands that John was doing his duty and that he was successful in completing the mission," isn't really a part of Matthew and John's reconciliation.

refinement: John and Matthew reconcile the incident by sharing tears and talking about the incident. John understands that Matthew couldn't have done anything to prevent the mines from going off.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: The main character, Matthew, tells his old friend John about the operation they just took part in. He reveals that he knew about a trap that John's platoon walked into, but was unable to warn them in time. John is understanding, and they both share a moment of grief and guilt.

text: It's omitted that John and his platoon are being celebrated for finishing a successful infantry op.

refinement: John, a lieutenant, and his platoon are being celebrated for finishing a successful infantry op. The main character, Matthew, tells his old friend John about the operation they just took part in. He reveals that he knew about a trap that John's platoon walked into, but was unable to warn them in time. John is understanding, and they both share a moment of grief and guilt.

text: It's omitted Matthew is in the CIA.  Replace "main character" with this information

refinement: John, a lieutenant, and his platoon are being celebrated for finishing a successful infantry op. Matthew, a CIA agent and spook, tells his old friend John about the operation they just took part in. He reveals that he knew about a trap that John's platoon walked into, but was unable to warn them in time. John is understanding, and they both share a moment of grief and guilt.

text: It's omitted that Matthew feels guilt over John's wounds and missing hand.

refinement: John, a lieutenant, and his platoon are being celebrated for finishing a successful infantry op. Matthew, a CIA agent and spook, sees John, his old friend, there and feels guilt over his wounds and missing hand. He tells John about the operation they just took part in. He reveals that he knew about a trap that John's platoon walked into, but was unable to warn them in time. John is understanding, and they both share a moment of grief and guilt.

text: Combine the third and fourth sentence to fit the sentence requirements.

refinement: John, a lieutenant, and his platoon are being celebrated for finishing a successful infantry op. Matthew, a CIA agent and spook, sees John, his old friend, there and feels guilt over his wounds and missing hand. He tells John about the operation they just took part in, that he knew about a trap that John's platoon walked into, but was unable to warn them in time. John is understanding, and they both share a moment of grief and guilt.

answer: Lieutenant John Morton is being honored for a successful infantry operation. An old school friend, Matthew Magee, is in attendance with guilt on his conscience. He hasn't seen John in nearly 15 years since he got medically declined for ROTC and went to work in the CIA, while John graduated top of his class and went to war. The two meet, and Matthew admits his guilt to John, and so they shed a tear together as only combat veterans who know the cost of war can.

text: It's omitted that Matthew feels guilty about having been responsible for John losing his hand.

refinement: Lieutenant John Morton is being honored for a successful infantry operation. An old school friend, Matthew Magee, is in attendance with guilt on his conscience. He hasn't seen John in nearly 15 years since he got medically declined for ROTC and went to work in the CIA, while John graduated top of his class and went to war. Matthew admits his guilt to John about being responsible for the loss of John's hand in the operation, and so they shed a tear together as only combat veterans who know the cost of war can.

answer: The narrator is the only man in the ballroom not wearing the Army Service Uniform. He is the MI liason for the CIA, providing key information to SF and Infantry units. He is at the party to celebrate the success of an infantry operation. He is there to see his old friend, John Morton, who was his best friend in school.

text: The narrator is named in the story, so he should be named in the summary.

refinement: The narrator, Matthew, is the only man in the ballroom not wearing the Army Service Uniform. He is the MI liason for the CIA, providing key information to SF and Infantry units. He is at the party to celebrate the success of an infantry operation. He is there to see his old friend, John Morton, who was his best friend in school.

text: Combine the third and fourth sentences to make room for more important information in the story.

refinement: The narrator, Matthew, is the only man in the ballroom not wearing the Army Service Uniform. He is the MI liason for the CIA, providing key information to SF and Infantry units. He is at the party to celebrate the success of an infantry operation, and an old friend, John, who served in the mission.

text: Remove the first sentence to make room for more important information in the story.

refinement: The narrator, Matthew, is the MI liaison for the CIA, providing key information to SF and Infantry units. He is at the party to celebrate the success of an infantry operation, and an old friend, John, who served in the mission.

text: Change "the party" to "a party".

refinement: The narrator, Matthew, is the MI liaison for the CIA, providing key information to SF and Infantry units. He is at a party to celebrate the success of an infantry operation, and an old friend, John, who served in the mission.

text: It's omitted that Matthew feels guilty and why.

refinement: The narrator, Matthew, is the MI liaison for the CIA, providing key information to SF and Infantry units. He is at a party to celebrate the success of an infantry operation, and an old friend, John, who served in the mission. Matthew is carrying guilt over the differences in he and John's similar careers, and that Matthew had prior knowledge of the mine incident that took John's hand and several lives.

text: It's omitted that Matthew confesses his guilt to John, and that the two share tears only combat veterans can share.

refinement: The narrator, Matthew, is the MI liaison for the CIA, providing key information to SF and Infantry units. He is at a party to celebrate the success of an infantry operation, and an old friend, John, who served in the mission. Matthew is carrying guilt over the differences in he and John's similar careers, and that Matthew had prior knowledge of the mine incident that took John's hand and several lives. Matthew confesses his guilt to John, and the two share tears only combat veterans can share.

answer: The MC is a CIA agent who is at a party for a platoon of soldiers who just completed a successful mission. The MC is the only one not wearing the Army Service Uniform. The MC is approached by his old friend John Morton, who is now a Lieutenant. John Morton is missing his left hand and has a long, jagged scar across his face. The MC tells John Morton that he is the one who gave the platoon the information about the mission, and that he knew about the mines that would go off. John Morton is understanding and they share tears.

text: The MC is not the narrator. The narrator is Matthew.

refinement: Matthew is a CIA agent who is at a party for a platoon of soldiers who just completed a successful mission. Matthew is the only one not wearing the Army Service Uniform. Matthew is approached by his old friend John Morton, who is now a Lieutenant. John Morton is missing his left hand and has a long, jagged scar across his face. Matthew tells John Morton that he is the one who gave the platoon the information about the mission, and that he knew about the mines that would go off. John Morton is understanding and they share tears.

text: "Matthew is the only one not wearing..." is unnecessary and makes this summary longer than requested.

refinement: Matthew is a CIA agent who is at a party for a platoon of soldiers who just completed a successful mission. Matthew is approached by his old friend John Morton, who is now a Lieutenant. John Morton is missing his left hand and has a long, jagged scar across his face. Matthew tells John Morton that he is the one who gave the platoon the information about the mission, and that he knew about the mines that would go off. John Morton is understanding and they share tears.

text: It's false that John approaches Matthew. It's the other way around.

refinement: Matthew is a CIA agent who is at a party for a platoon of soldiers who just completed a successful mission. Matthew approaches his old friend John Morton, who is now a Lieutenant. John Morton is missing his left hand and has a long, jagged scar across his face. Matthew tells John Morton that he is the one who gave the platoon the information about the mission, and that he knew about the mines that would go off. John Morton is understanding and they share tears.

text: Combine the second and third sentences to meet the four sentence requirements.

refinement: Matthew is a CIA agent who is at a party for a platoon of soldiers who just completed a successful mission. Matthew approaches his old friend John Morton, who is now a Lieutenant and is now missing his left hand. Matthew tells John that he is the one who gave the platoon the information about the mission, and that he knew about the mines that would go off. John Morton is understanding and they share tears.

text: It's omitted that  Matthew feels guilt over John's hand.

refinement: Matthew is a CIA agent who is at a party for a platoon of soldiers who just completed a successful mission. Matthew approaches his old friend John Morton, who is now a Lieutenant and is now missing his left hand. Feeling that he is responsible for John's condition, Matthew tells John that he is the one who gave the platoon the information about the mission, and that he knew about the mines that would go off. John Morton is understanding and they share tears.


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The STRIPED WHIPSNAKE (_Masticophis taeniatus_) is a species of nonvenomous snake in the family Colubridae. It is closely related to the California whipsnake (_Masticophis lateralis_). The striped whipsnake is native to the western United States and adjacent northern Mexico.

Identification

The striped whipsnake is approximately 30-72 inches (76–183 cm) in total length (including tail). This snake exhibits black, dark brown, or gray coloration on its back, often with an olive or bluish tint. Along the center of each of the first four rows of pale dorsal scales, is a dark longitudinal stripe. There is a white to cream-colored stripe down its side that is bisected by either a solid or dashed black line. The coloring on the snake's belly tends to be cream to yellowish, fading to white toward the head, and coral pink toward the tail. This snake also features a lower preocular between the upper labial scales of the mouth. The anal scale is divided.

Geographic range

The striped whipsnake is found throughout the western United States and northern Mexico. The northernmost part of its geographic range is in south central Washington, and continues southward into the Great Basin between the Cascade-Sierran crest and the continental divide. Its range then continues southeast across the continental divide into New Mexico and western and central Texas. The southernmost part of its range lies in Michoacán, Mexico. In the Western United States its range also extends outside of the Great Basin into the Rogue River Valley in southwestern Oregon and northern California. There is a population in Bryce Canyon National Park in Utah.

Habitat

The striped whipsnake is commonly found in a wide variety of habitats including shrub lands, grasslands, sagebrush flats, canyons, piñon-juniper woodlands, and open pine-oak forests. It is attracted to both permanent and seasonal rocky streams, and it frequents both flatlands and mountains.

Behavior

The species _M. taeniatus_ is diurnal, active during the day, and is very alert and fast moving. It seeks shelter in rock outcrops, small mammal burrows, as well as in trees and shrubs depending on the habitat they occupy. This snake is nonvenomous, but it preys on a wide variety of species including lizards, other snakes (including venomous rattlesnakes), small mammals, young birds, frogs, and insects.

Reproduction

Little is known about the reproductive activities of _M. taeniatus_. After fertilization the female striped whipsnake will lay a clutch of 3-12 eggs, between the months of June and July, usually in an abandoned rodent burrow. One study has shown a natural incubation period of 44 to 58 days.

Subspecies

There are two subspecies of _Masticophis taeniatus_ which are recognized as being valid, including the nominotypical subspecies.[1]

-   _Masticophis taeniatus girardi_ [2]
-   _Masticophis taeniatus taeniatus_

_Nota bene_: A trinomial authority in parentheses indicates that the subspecies was originally described in a genus other than _Masticophis_.

Etymology

The subspecific name, _girardi_, is in honor of French-American herpetologist Charles Frédéric Girard.[3]

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[3] Beolens, Bo; Watkins, Michael; Grayson, Michael (2011). _The Eponym Dictionary of Reptiles_. Baltimore: Johns Hopkins University Press. xiii + 296 pp. . (_Masticophis taeniatus girardi_, p. 101).

title: Striped whipsnake

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Is the striped whipsnake dangerous to human beings?

answer: This information is not mentioned.

text: While it is not explicitly mentioned that the snake is not dangerous, it is noted to be nonvenomous, with the implication that is therefore not, or less dangerous to humans.

refinement: This snake is nonvenomous, and is implied to not pose a serious danger, if any, to human beings.

answer: No. The striped whipsnake is nonvenomous.

answer: Since the striped whipsnake is not venomous, it is not as dangerous to people as venomous snakes. However, it can still reach a length of 183cm, which means it can still cause harm to infants and small children. Overall, it cannot be considered to be dangerous to humans.

text: The suggestion that the snake could cause harm to infants and small children, while plausible, is a bit more of a conjecture. The fact that it preys on smaller animals suggests it could be the case but it's not perhaps strong enough evidence.

refinement: Since the striped whipsnake is not venomous, it is not as dangerous to people as venomous snakes.

answer: No, the striped whipsnake is not dangerous to human beings.

text: The answer should include the key reason why the whipsnake is not (likely to be) dangerous to humans

refinement: No, the striped whipsnake is not dangerous to human beings as it is nonvenomous

answer: The snake is non-venomous and there is nothing in the article to suggest that it is aggressive in nature.