text:
James Garcia date of death October 13,2014 5:32 PM El Paso, Texas, USA

“Ugh my head is on fire.”

“Getting hit by a couple hundred pounds of metal moving 90 miles an hour will do that to you.”

James shielded his eyes attempting to obscure the bright light radiating from the white landscape surrounding him. A tall figure with a stout build and a familiar gait gradually began to approach him. As his eyes began to adjust James could see the creature. It was clad in a plaid button up and a dusty pair of wranglers. James pressed his lips together to speak but all he could muster up was a quick puff of stale air.

“How would you feel about being black this time? Caribbean? Hell
maybe even Haitian?”

“Dad?” James managed to stammer up.

The being sighed and shook his head.

“Hhhmmm or how about something Oriental? Wait is that the pc term? Oh well lovely group of people nonetheless smart, strong, and fertile as all get out. Jackie Chan is freaking awesome. Have you Rush Ho..”

“DAD?!?!” James spouted after finally catching his breath.

“Jeez kid loosen up a bit will ya’? I’m not your dad ok, although I do get that a lot.”

“If you’re not my dad then who the fuck are you?”

“Wow language. As for who I am. That’s a good question not sure of that myself. You guys have given me a lot of names over the years Yahweh, God, the Grim something or other.”

James shot the man a look consisting of disbelief and frustration.

“Look I’m not gonna sugar-coat it mate, you’re dead. You were on the way to that girl’s house. What’s her name? I remember it was something stupid? Britni? Brooke?

“Barbra.”

The man snapped his thick callused fingers.

“Oh yeah that’s it! Anyway you were on your way to Barbra’s and you got hit by a car; a Dodge Caravan no less. Death by Mini Van, how about that.” The man chuckled to himself. “If more of you guys would just look both ways before crossing the street my job would be immensely easier.”

James was becoming agitated

“Ok so if I’m dead where I am? Heaven? And why the hell do you look like my dad?!”

The man let out a long drawn out sigh

“Look I been at this long enough to know that I appear as the person you trust the most. Pretty cheesy I know but you’d be surprised how much easier it makes the transition. Heaven? Naw mate you’re a little far off from heaven.”

James face shifted from agitation to unease and he began to twiddle his thumbs.

“So Hell then…”

“Goodness no! Ok listen up mate can you say with absolute certainty that you were happy with your life. A 25 year old pizza delivery boy, with a bachelor’s degree in art history whatever that means, dating a women named Barbra. Do you even like her?”

“…No”

“See.” The bulky figure said with a large grin

“I believe in chances. I don’t like to let people move on until they are truly happy. Life’s a gift if you don’t get to fully enjoy it what’s the point?”

“So what? You just reset it?”

He nodded “More or less  new race, gender, intelligence, nationality the whole bada bing. So how ya feeling now? You up to it?”

“Do I honestly have a choice?”

“Well you can say no but that won’t really stop me. Not like you’re going to remember any of this anyway we’ve had this talk before”

“This isn’t the first time I’ve died.”

“This the first time *James* has died.”

“So how ma..”

“This will make about 678.”

“Christ that’s a lot.”

“Let’s just say you’re accident prone. So what do ya  say mate wanna give it another go?”

“Let’s do it not like I have anything to lose. Could I maybe be European or something? You know the whole blond with blue eyes thing kills the girls.”

The man smiled rolling up his sleeves and nodding

“Sure mate no problem.”

Eno Akpu-nku date of birth October 14,2014 2:33 AM Johannesburg, Gauteng, Africa

title: Again(697 words)

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How has James arrived at this transition between lives?

answer: [rewrite]

text: The response doesn't mention anything related to the transition between lives. The man arrived at the transition between lives when he was hit by a Dodge Caravan when he was crossing the road.

refinement: James died when he was on his way to Barbra's house. He was hit by a Dodge Caravan while crossing the street. He then woke up at the transition between lives.

answer: He was hit by a car, and travels to the afterlife to have a choice of who to be and experience another life within him.

answer:
According to the big fellow, his previous life had been spent working as a pizza delivery boy in order to make ends meet. His work hours were long, he was in bad shape relation-wise, and he was about to leave for another woman when a fourth car knocked him going 90 mph. This was around 5:30 p.m. on October 13, 2014.

The man offering James another life believes in the fact wicked should pay dearly, which was initially what was on James' mind as he died. The man says James has been like this - dying and starting anew - quite a lot, as he has only given him his current identity of Eno (James' new identity) as the first in a series of 678 previous lives.

text: The response doesn't mention who the big fellow is.

refinement:
According to the big fellow (god), his previous life had been spent working as a pizza delivery boy in order to make ends meet. His work hours were long, he was in bad shape relation-wise, and he was about to leave for another woman when a fourth car knocked him going 90 mph. This was around 5:30 p.m. on October 13, 2014.

The man offering James another life believes in the fact wicked should pay dearly, which was initially what was on James' mind as he died. The man says James has been like this - dying and starting anew - quite a lot, as he has only given him his current identity of Eno (James' new identity) as the first in a series of 678 previous lives.

text: The text doesn't mention that James's work hours were long.

refinement:
According to the big fellow (god), his previous life had been spent working as a pizza delivery boy in order to make ends meet. He was in bad shape relation-wise, and he was about to leave for another woman when a fourth car knocked him going 90 mph. This was around 5:30 p.m. on October 13, 2014.

The man offering James another life believes in the fact wicked should pay dearly, which was initially what was on James' mind as he died. The man says James has been like this - dying and starting anew - quite a lot, as he has only given him his current identity of Eno (James' new identity) as the first in a series of 678 previous lives.

text: He was going to meet Barbra, his girlfriend when a speeding Dodge Caravan hit him.

refinement:
According to the big fellow (god), his previous life had been spent working as a pizza delivery boy in order to make ends meet. He was in bad shape relation-wise, and he was going to meet Barbra, his girlfriend, when a Dodge Caravan knocked him going 90 mph. This was around 5:30 p.m. on October 13, 2014.

The man offering James another life believes in the fact wicked should pay dearly, which was initially what was on James' mind as he died. The man says James has been like this - dying and starting anew - quite a lot, as he has only given him his current identity of Eno (James' new identity) as the first in a series of 678 previous lives.

text: God doesn't believe in making the wicked pay dearly. Instead, he wants a person to live their life happily and doesn't let them move on until they're happy. That wasn't on James's mind when he died too.

refinement:
According to the big fellow (god), his previous life had been spent working as a pizza delivery boy in order to make ends meet. He was in bad shape relation-wise, and he was going to meet Barbra, his girlfriend, when a Dodge Caravan knocked him going 90 mph. This was around 5:30 p.m. on October 13, 2014.

The man offering James another life believes that a person should be given chances to live their life happily. The man says James has been like this - dying and starting anew - quite a lot, as he has only given him his current identity of Eno (James' new identity) as the first in a series of 678 previous lives.

answer: He was hit by a car.

text: The response doesn't mention that James died after getting hit by the car.

refinement: He was hit by a car and died to arrive at the transition point between lives.

answer: He has died in a car accident. He has been killed by (a) van.

text: The brackets aren't needed.

refinement: He has died in a car accident. He has been killed by a van.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why does James think that he is talking to his dad?

answer: Because he has never seen him.

text: James thinks he's talking to his dad as god appears to look like the person he trusts the most — his dad.

refinement: Because God looks like the person who James trusts the most, which is his father.

answer: It appears that he has been having the same conversation with this man quite a few times before.

text: This isn't the reason that he thinks that he's talking to his dad. He does so because God looks like his dad — the person he trusts the most.

refinement: Because God looks like the person who James trusts the most, which is his father.

answer: It's possible that he is confused and doesn't realize why his father and the man in the white landscape are identical.

text: The response doesn't mention why the man and James's father look identical.

refinement: James's father and the man in the white landscape are identical because God looks like the person James trusts the most — his father.

answer: It appears that he has been having the same conversation with this man quite a few times before. This can be interpreted to mean that he thinks that he is dead and talking to God.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why must James return as another person?

answer: James has died several hundred times by the time he is 25, and each life has been marked by unhappiness and wasted potential. In each new life, James is reborn with the form of a dead loved one and all the memories he has accumulated. Apparently, the watchman in charge of the process owes up to 600 times he must repeat his request. James wants his next life to better his life in the current one.

text: Incorrect. James has died several times across his existence. He was 25 when he died in his current form as James Garcia.

refinement: James has died several hundred times during his existence, and each life has been marked by unhappiness and wasted potential. In each new life, James is reborn with the form of a dead loved one and all the memories he has accumulated. Apparently, the watchman in charge of the process owes up to 600 times he must repeat his request. James wants his next life to better his life in the current one.

text: James is born in the form of a new person and has no memories accumulated. He isn't born in the form of a dead loved one.

refinement: James has died several hundred times during his existence, and each life has been marked by unhappiness and wasted potential. In each new life, James is reborn with a new form and without any of his previous memories. Apparently, the watchman in charge of the process owes up to 600 times he must repeat his request. James wants his next life to better his life in the current one.

text: The watchman here is God and he has given James 678 lives until now but not because he owes him something.

refinement: James has died several hundred times during his existence, and each life has been marked by unhappiness and wasted potential. In each new life, James is reborn with a new form and without any of his previous memories. God is in charge of the process and has given birth to James 678 times until now. James wants his next life to better his life in the current one.

text: The sentence is written in a confusing manner.

refinement: James has died several hundred times during his existence, and each life has been marked by unhappiness and wasted potential. In each new life, James is reborn with a new form and without any of his previous memories. God is in charge of the process and has given birth to James 678 times until now. James wants his next life to be better than his current life.

answer: When the Grim Reaper tells James he's been killed once more, he notes that he just can't move on into Heaven. This leads to another iteration of James, this time a "black" man named Eno Akpu-nku of Gauteng, Africa.

text: The response doesn't mention why James can't move on to Heaven.

refinement: When the Grim Reaper tells James he's been killed once more, he notes that he just can't move on into Heaven. This is because he hasn't had a completely happy life until now in all of his 678 lives. This leads to another iteration of James, this time a "black" man named Eno Akpu-nku of Gauteng, Africa.

answer: James has had 678 deaths before this, he is accident-prone.

text: The response doesn't mention why James has to return as another person.

refinement: James has had 678 deaths before this, he is accident-prone. God doesn't want to send him to heaven until he's enjoyed his life to the fullest. And for that reason, he sends him back as another person.

answer: James has died several hundred times by the time he is 25, and each life has been marked by unhappiness and wasted potential. The watchman in charge of the process owes up to 600 times he must repeat his request. James wants his next life to better his life in the current one.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Will James be happy with his reincarnation?

answer: James was a pizza delivery boy who pumped iron and ran to improve his physique. He says that he didn't like any of his lives, but cannot remember the lives he lives. The man reincarnates James, reincarnates James according to the way in which he lived his past lives. Common first names include James, John, and occasionally Michael. James requested to be a blond with blue eyes but the man reincarnates him identically to the living James in all other respects.

text: The text doesn't mention anything about James running and pumping iron to improve his physique.

refinement: James was a pizza delivery boy. He says that he didn't like any of his lives, but cannot remember the lives he lives. The man reincarnates James, reincarnates James according to the way in which he lived his past lives. Common first names include James, John, and occasionally Michael. James requested to be a blond with blue eyes but the man reincarnates him identically to the living James in all other respects.

text: James doesn't say that he didn't like any of his lives. Instead, it's implied that he didn't like his current life as James.

refinement: James was a pizza delivery boy. It's implied that he didn't like his current life. The man reincarnates James, reincarnates James according to the way in which he lived his past lives. Common first names include James, John, and occasionally Michael. James requested to be a blond with blue eyes but the man reincarnates him identically to the living James in all other respects.

text: The man doesn't reincarnate James in the manner in which he lived his previous lives. Instead, he reincarnates him as a new person.

refinement: James was a pizza delivery boy. It's implied that he didn't like his current life. The man reincarnates James into a new person from a different country, race, etc. Common first names include James, John, and occasionally Michael. James requested to be a blond with blue eyes but the man reincarnates him identically to the living James in all other respects.

text: The text mentions nothing related to various name options for James.

refinement: James was a pizza delivery boy. It's implied that he didn't like his current life. The man reincarnates James into a new person from a different country, race, etc. James requested to be a blond with blue eyes but the man reincarnates him identically to the living James in all other respects.

text: Incorrect. God doesn't reincarnate James identically to the living James. Instead, he reincarnates him as a South African named Eno.

refinement: James was a pizza delivery boy. It's implied that he didn't like his current life. The man reincarnates James into a new person from a different country, race, etc. James requested to be a blond with blue eyes but the man reincarnates him as a South African named Eno.

text: The response doesn't mention if James will be happy with his reincarnation.

refinement: James was a pizza delivery boy. It's implied that he didn't like his current life. The man reincarnates James into a new person from a different country, race, etc. James requested to be a blond with blue eyes but the man reincarnates him as a South African named Eno. So, it's likely that he won't be happy with his reincarnation.

answer: James may not be happy with his reincarnation because his current lifestyle is boring and he isn't dating Barbra.

text: This isn't the reason why he may not be happy with his reincarnation. Instead, it's because God didn't reincarnate him into the form he wanted.

refinement: James may not be happy with his reincarnation because he wanted to become a blond European with blue eyes, but instead, God reincarnated him as a South African.

answer: his last life's objective was to get to his date with Barbra. By the end of the story, he hasn't changed his mind about her. He's not cautious, his belief in a chance has completely been destroyed, and whether or not the universe deems him ready enough to make the right decision, he can't.

text: All of this information has nothing to do with the reincarnation of James.

text: The response doesn't mention whether James will be happy with his reincarnation or not.

refinement: James may not be happy with his reincarnation as he got reincarnated as an African. However, he wanted to become a blond European with blue eyes.


split: train

text:
Part of the Council for International Schools (CIS) accreditation process asks schools to “demonstrate a commitment to internationalism/interculturalism in education” and that this should be “reflected throughout the life of the institution.” In this article, I will be presenting the case that schools of a religious tradition are best placed to fulfil this aspect of education given their deeply rooted sense of history, tradition and culture.

In her book “International Mindedness” Lesley Stagg concludes by paraphrasing Dan Young “Internationalism advocates the quality of ‘being’ international within the overall climate and character evident when you enter the school. It includes the one for all organizational principles that reflect a global community concern (known to its community to exist inside and outside its walls), as well as an overall positive attitude between diverse cultures (and countries). It is evidenced where students and faculty celebrate this quality as they come together for learning and teaching… when common global interests and collaboration are recognized as imperative.”

To my mind, in order to successfully meet this goal, it is essential that the school have at least one unifying feature. There must be something tangible that unites all in the midst of diversity. CIS exhorts the guiding statements of a school as this focal point and these guiding statements must be embedded in the curriculum and in the culture of learning. This is not particularly controversial and is something commonly accepted in the domain of international schools. However, I would like to suggest that in reality, many international schools across the world do not have this one unifying feature and that, in fact in many cases, their guiding statements are contrived, jargonistic and essentially meaningless. The exception to this fact being those schools, which have a deep-rooted sense of history, enshrined in tradition and have a culture that is known and embraced by the wider community. I would argue that this is the case in schools underpinned by a religious tradition.

Moreover, in order to create an “overall positive attitude between diverse cultures (and countries)” it is necessary to celebrate what unites families from diverse cultures and countries and in many cases, this is their religious experience. Children from a multitude of countries, different races, speaking different languages and having a range of cultural norms, inevitably populate an International School. Finding something to unite such a diverse community is a challenge CIS recognizes, but within a school embracing a religious tradition, there is no challenge because, despite the obvious diversity, children and their families are united by their religious beliefs. This is more obviously the case when they all hark from the same religious tradition, but I contend that it can also be the case when children of different religions, or denominations within a particular religion, are educated together as their belief in God (or in some cases a Supreme Being) transcends any of their apparent differences. Many dismiss too often religion as a cause of conflict but I would argue the contrary and suggest that in reality religion unites people due to the fact that they have a common sense of purpose and of human dignity. Nothing is more unifying than a common set of beliefs. This permeates deeper than any contrived ideology.

Central to religious identity is a call to community, to social justice, to a respect for human dignity, to peace and reconciliation and to celebrating unity in diversity. These are the features of international mindedness that CIS wants schools to embrace. Whilst many schools barely touch the tip of the iceberg with respect to international mindedness, schools with a religious identity and faith commitment are deeply rooted in their sense of mission, of their ethos, of their values. International Schools of a non-religious nature could learn a lot by looking at schools of a religious nature. They would observe that in the vast majority of cases (some schools with a religious identity are clearly better than others) that the guiding statements of the school are embedded throughout the institution. In the best schools, the mission and ethos of the school are deeply embedded in the curriculum. Such schools do not have a narrow view of curriculum as merely the teaching of a syllabus or academic program but moreover that it is inclusive of all aspects of a child’s learning experience and development as a human person. Subsequently, children will learn explicitly about issues of prejudice and discrimination, different belief systems (other than that of the denomination of the institution), ethical systems, cultural norms, the dignity of the human person, social enterprise and the like. Furthermore, schools with a religious tradition have always valued prayer and meditation as an essential part of human development. Recognizing this the secular world now promotes “mindfulness” as a non-religious alternative to meditation. Separating meditation from faith, where Buddhist, Christian or another, is somewhat morally bankrupt and a very dubious business in itself.

Many international schools have adopted mission statements but sometimes these are a uniformity of bland clichés with no deep sense of an underlying philosophy. Perhaps even more worrying is the trend for schools to adopt the language of “No child left behind” and focus on college and workplace preparedness as the raison d’etre of education rather than focusing on the development of the whole child with the human dignity. It is immoral to see a child as no more than economic fodder for the future workplace. Schools should reject any policy or system that diminishes the dignity of the human person and refutes the idea that anyone can be reduced to the status of an economic unit or passive-dependent.

Recognizing the distinct nature that schools underpinned by a religious tradition have, and by learning from their best practice, International Schools across the world can learn to emulate the “one for all” educational principles that underpin faith schools. The shared “worldview” that unites people of faiths underpins the values and mission of such schools and enables them to be truly international.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the CIS?

answer: The text argues that schools with a religious tradition have a distinct advantage over secular schools in meeting CIS's goal of demonstrating a commitment to internationalism-interculturalism in education. According to the text, this is because schools of a religious tradition are deeply rooted in their sense of history, tradition and have a culture that is known and embraced by the wider community. The text further argues that this feature enables religious schools to consciously implement a mission and ethos, which in turn leads to a deeper understanding and respect for individuals of diverse backgrounds. The text concludes by asserting that secular international schools could learn something from schools of a religious tradition. Specifically, secular schools could learn from the ways that schools with a religious tradition effectively implement a commitment to internationalism-interasticalism in education.

text: "The text" is used too often and makes the response sound blocky.

refinement: The text argues that schools with a religious tradition have a distinct advantage over secular schools in meeting CIS's goal of demonstrating a commitment to internationalism-interculturalism in education. This is because schools of a religious tradition are deeply rooted in their sense of history, tradition and have a culture that is known and embraced by the wider community. This feature enables religious schools to consciously implement a mission and ethos, which in turn leads to a deeper understanding and respect for individuals of diverse backgrounds. It concludes by asserting that secular international schools could learn something from schools of a religious tradition. Specifically, secular schools could learn from the ways that schools with a religious tradition effectively implement a commitment to internationalism-interasticalism in education.

text: These last two sentences contain the same idea making it sound redundant.

refinement: The text argues that schools with a religious tradition have a distinct advantage over secular schools in meeting CIS's goal of demonstrating a commitment to internationalism-interculturalism in education. This is because schools of a religious tradition are deeply rooted in their sense of history, tradition and have a culture that is known and embraced by the wider community. This feature enables religious schools to consciously implement a mission and ethos, which in turn leads to a deeper understanding and respect for individuals of diverse backgrounds. It concludes by asserting that secular international schools could learn something from schools of a religious tradition in order to effectively implement a commitment to internationalism-interasticalism in education.

text: The response does not properly explain why they believe that the schools of religious background have a deeper sense of unity than secular international schools. It is not just embraced by the wider community, they are also united by their common belief.

refinement: The text argues that schools with a religious tradition have a distinct advantage over secular schools in meeting CIS's goal of demonstrating a commitment to internationalism-interculturalism in education. This is because schools of a religious tradition are deeply rooted in their sense of history, tradition and have a culture that is known and embraced by the wider community. This common belief that they all share is what makes it easier for them to be more inclusive of most cultures. This feature enables religious schools to consciously implement a mission and ethos, which in turn leads to a deeper understanding and respect for individuals of diverse backgrounds. It concludes by asserting that secular international schools could learn something from schools of a religious tradition in order to effectively implement a commitment to internationalism-interasticalism in education.

answer: It states that it asks schools to show a commitment to internationalism and that this should be reflected throughout the life of the institution.

answer: The author presents the case that schools of a religious tradition are best placed to fulfill the accreditation process of the Council for International Schools (CIS), whenever the goal is to show commitment to internationalism or interculturalism in education. In other words, religious schools are more likely to commit to internationalism/interculturalism due to their deeply rooted sense of history, tradition and culture.

answer: The text argues that schools of a religious tradition are best placed to create an "overall positive attitude between diverse cultures" due to their mission and philosophy. Schools without such a connection are not nearly as effective at fostering an environment of global awareness. The CIS is exhorting schools to embrace internationalism as a guiding principle, and schools of a religious tradition have a distinct advantage in this process. The CIS wants schools to create a cohesive environment that promotes understanding and acceptance of diversity, and schools of a religious tradition are better placed to do this due to their guiding philosophy and mission.

answer: The CIS accreditation asks schools to demonstrate a commitment to internationalism in education and that this be reflected throughout the life of the institution. The author argues there must be one feature that unifies all cultures in order for an international school to be more inclusive and respectful of everyone's traditions.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about international schools?

answer: The text asserts that schools rooted in a religious tradition are better placed than schools with a non-religious tradition in order to fulfill CIS's goal of demonstrating a commitment to internationalism/interculturalism in education. Schools with a religious identity foster a sense of community that unites people from diverse cultures and countries. Furthermore, the religious perspective offers a shared worldview that encourages respect for the dignity of the human person and deepens the development of a child through a focus on meditation and other practices that promote mindfulness. The qualitative difference that schools rooted in a religious tradition have over schools of a non-religious nature make them better situated to fulfill the goal of international mindedness.

answer: The author asserts that many international schools do not have one unifying feature that binds everyone together in the midst of their diversity. He states that schools embodying a religious tradition are best placed to fulfil the CIS requirement of demonstrating interculturalism in education due to their deeply rooted sense of history, tradition, and culture.

answer: The text makes the argument that schools with a religious tradition are better positioned to promote international mindedness due to their historical, traditional, and cohesive culture. Schools without a religious tradition struggle to establish an ethos or identity which can unify the diverse population, whereas religious schools with a cohesive set of core values and mission can better undertake this critical aspect of education. Accordingly, international schools could benefit from looking at schools of religious tradition for their effective models of international mindedness.

answer: International schools are first encouraged by the Council for International Schools (CIS) to have "(referring to) all aspects that really drive the pedagogy and culture of the institution". However, schools of all backgrounds have been reported not to have had this standard. Most of the articles state a school's statement of purpose and vision are not much more than clichés with no substance. This is why the text advises against adopting this language for a school's mission: "no child left behind", "worksite preparedness", "college readiness", etc. CIS states that this language (referring to the language of "No child left behind") is common to schools of faith, but such schools are more than this; they promote mindsets for social justice and peace and reconciliation.

text: There is no mention in the text of the CIS encouraging the international schools to have "all aspects that really drive the pedagogy and culture of the institution."

refinement: International schools are first encouraged by the Council for International Schools (CIS) to demonstrate a commitment to interculturalism/internationalism. However, schools of all backgrounds have been reported not to have had this standard. Most of the articles state a school's statement of purpose and vision are not much more than clichés with no substance. This is why the text advises against adopting this language for a school's mission: "no child left behind", "worksite preparedness", "college readiness", etc. CIS states that this language (referring to the language of "No child left behind") is common to schools of faith, but such schools are more than this; they promote mindsets for social justice and peace and reconciliation.

answer: International schools need one unifying feature for everyone to get along. Many argue that religion is a cause for conflict but the author believes otherwise. The belief in God transcends any disagreement or differences between different races.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about cultural norms?

answer: The text argues that schools with an underlying religious tradition are in a better position to create an "overall positive attitude between diverse cultures (and countries)" because of their shared beliefs and values, which shape their ethos and permeate the curriculum. One aspect of this ethos is a respect for cultural norms. In schools rooted in a religious tradition, children are united by their religious beliefs despite their different cultural backgrounds.

answer: The author argues that schools with a religious tradition help unify diverse communities due to the fact that they have a shared sense of purpose and of human dignity. Part of this is due to their understanding of cultural norms, which are seen as things that people have in common. This common understanding transcends any apparent differences.

text: There is no mention in the text that religious schools have a deeper understanding of cultural norms. Only that a common faith helps them oversee any other apparent differences.

refinement: The author argues that schools with a religious tradition help unify diverse communities due to the fact that they have a shared sense of purpose and of human dignity.

text: The response no longer answers the question.

refinement: The author argues that schools with a religious tradition help unify diverse communities due to the fact that they have a shared sense of purpose and of human dignity. This oversees any apparent differences in their cultural norms.

answer:
The author says that within a school embracing a religious tradition, there is no challenge because, despite the obvious diversity, the students knows that they'll be united by their religious beliefs.

They also say that in a school respecting human dignity, they'll have a common set of beliefs that permeates deeper than any contrived ideology.

text: There is no mention of cultural norms in the response.

refinement:
The author says that within a school embracing a religious tradition, there is no challenge because, despite the obvious diversity in their different cultural norms, the students knows that they'll be united by their religious beliefs.

They also say that in a school respecting human dignity, they'll have a common set of beliefs that permeates deeper than any contrived ideology.

answer: The author claims that implementing interculturalism in most schools needs a unifying feature to keep everything harmonized. Children from different cultural races and live by different cultural norms is a challenge CIS recognizes. However, CIS believes that there is no challenge since different cultures are united by their religious beliefs.

text: There is no indication in the text that the CIS claims that there is no challenge in different cultures among international schools as long as they are unified by their religious beliefs. It is the author who believes this.

refinement: The author claims that implementing interculturalism in most schools needs a unifying feature to keep everything harmonized. Children from different cultural races and live by different cultural norms is a challenge CIS recognizes. However, the author believes that there is no challenge since different cultures are united by their religious beliefs.

text: minor grammar issue.

refinement: The author claims that implementing interculturalism in most schools needs a unifying feature to keep everything harmonized. Children from different cultural races and living by different cultural norms is a challenge CIS recognizes. However, the author believes that there is no challenge since different cultures are united by their religious beliefs.

answer: The text contends that children outside the school appreciate and are willing to learn the cultural norms within the school, because this enhances learning-the goal of all education. This experience helps children realize firsthand that they occupy a global and multicultural society, and learn how to tolerate and understand the differences between cultures.

text: The response is not specific as to what it means by "children outside the school." It does not refer to what school. It also does not mention that the author believes that having a common religious belief will help unify international schools.

refinement: The text contends that children in religious schools appreciate and are willing to learn the cultural norms within the school, because this enhances learning-the goal of all education. This experience helps children realize firsthand that they occupy a global and multicultural society, and learn how to tolerate and understand the differences between cultures.

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refinement: The text contends that children in religious schools appreciate and are willing to learn the cultural norms within the school because this enhances learning-the goal of all education. This experience helps children realize firsthand that they occupy a global and multicultural society, and learn how to tolerate and understand the differences between cultures.

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Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about diversity?

answer: The text argues that schools with a strongly rooted tradition or religious identity are best positioned to create an environment where diversity can be embraced. In these schools, there is a shared worldview that is uniting, and this allows for a positive stance toward diversity amongst students, faculty and families. This positive stance toward diversity is crucial in creating an environment where students can be truly international minded.

answer: Despite obvious diversity, children and their families can be united according to CIS. This makes it easier for them to implement interculturalism in most schools. Many international schools have adopted this.

text: There is no mention in the text that the CIS believes religion is a unifying factor for international schools. The author believes this, not the organization.

refinement: Despite obvious diversity, children and their families can be united according to the author. This makes it easier for them to implement interculturalism in most schools. Many international schools have adopted this.

answer: Students from different countries, different races, languages, and cultures are coming together with unified religious identity. Perhaps the most obvious example is with religions that have a strong central leader or focal point. However, even with religions that do have that focal point, there are still plenty of differences amongst the hundreds or even thousands of denominations it can have. In the last example, minor differences -such as nondenominational practices- can be a unifying force as well. The crux of the argument seems to be that there can always be some type of commonality amongst the members of an international school to unite them. Religion seems to be the easiest and most common answer to that due to its importance to communal activities and practices. The text also points out that it is easy to appreciate the unifying nature of religious faith because it is often protected against marginalization.

answer: An essential part in facilitating diversity in a school is unifying students with a sense of purpose and of human dignity. Schools with deep-rooted history and tradition are able to fulfill this challenge, because children and parents all come from diverse backgrounds, they are united by their faith. No matter how diverse the backgrounds, children can come together to learn and feel accepted and loved unconditionally, provided the school unifies people and institutes a positive environment for all faiths.

answer: The text argues that schools underpinned by a religious tradition are better placed to fulfil an educational commitment to international mindedness due to their sense of history and tradition, which unifies the diverse community. The text also argues that schools with a religious identity emphasize values such as social justice and human dignity and focus on the whole child. The text asserts that this focus on values and human dignity is what is necessary for international mindedness. The text concludes by saying that schools without a religious identity would benefit from looking to schools with a religious identity in order to emulate the one for all principles that they share.

text: "The text" is overused making the text sound blocky.

refinement: The text argues that schools underpinned by a religious tradition are better placed to fulfil an educational commitment to international mindedness due to their sense of history and tradition, which unifies the diverse community. It also argues that schools with a religious identity emphasize values such as social justice and human dignity and focus on the whole child. The author further asserts that this focus on values and human dignity is what is necessary for international mindedness. It concludes by claiming that schools without a religious identity would benefit from looking to schools with a religious identity in order to emulate the one for all principles that they share.

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refinement: The text argues that schools underpinned by a religious tradition are better placed to fulfill an educational commitment to international-mindedness due to their sense of history and tradition, which unifies the diverse community. It also argues that schools with a religious identity emphasize values such as social justice and human dignity and focus on the whole child. The author further asserts that this focus on values and human dignity is what is necessary for international mindedness. It concludes by claiming that schools without a religious identity would benefit from looking to schools with religious identity in order to emulate the one for all principles that they share.


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Froggys Fog has "A Fluid for Every Effect!" If you are looking for for the perfect low lying stage fog, the longest lasting water based fog, the right haze juice for your machine, a bubble juice that outperforms the rest or a snow juice that evaporates after floating for only 30 feet, Froggys Fog has that and so much more. Froggys Fog also has scent additives that are compatible with any water based fog, haze, snow and bubble fluid.

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question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What is QuikBlast?

answer: QuikBlast is a thick, white, quick-dissipating fog formula. It is great for creating powerful, dense blasts of fog.

answer: QuikBlast is the fluid for steam pipe and other "quick smoke" effects such as CO2 canisters.

answer: QuikBlast is a thick, rapid dissipation smoke formula that is ideal for creating quick puffs, blasts, and columns of fog.

answer: It is a fluid ideally used for steam pipe and other "quick smoke" effects.

text: Doesn't describe the effects.

refinement: It is a fluid ideally used for steam pipe and other "quick smoke" effects creating a thick white burst of smoke that is gone in mere seconds.

answer: A fluid that creates quick smoke.

text: Doesn't describe the instruments it's used with.

refinement: A fluid that creates quick smoke used in steam pipes and CO2 canisters.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What is QuikBlast made of?

answer: QuikBlast is a thick smoke formula which creates a burst of dense smoke that dissipates quickly. This formula is designed for use with any water based fog machine.

text: Doesn't mention its ingredients.

refinement: QuikBlast is a thick smoke formula which creates a burst of dense smoke that dissipates quickly. This formula is designed for use with any water based fog machine. It is made from lab-grade UV-filtered de-ionized water and pharmaceutical grade chemicals.

answer: It is smoke that is gone in mere seconds.

text: Doesn't mention its ingredients.

refinement: It's made from lab-grade UV-filtered de-ionized water and pharmaceutical grade chemicals.

answer: QuikBlast is a thick white burst of smoke made from lab-grade UV-filtered de-ionized water and pharmaceutical grade chemicals.

answer: QuikBlast is made from lab-grade UV-Filtered de-ionized water and pharmaceutical grade chemicals.

answer: It is made from lab-grade UV-Filtered de-ionized water and pharmaceutical grade chemicals.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What is QuikBlast used for?

answer: It creates a thick white burst of smoke. It can be used in upshot and flex foggers to create the effect of a CO2 Blast Effect.

answer: QuikBlast is the ideal fluid for steam pipe and other "quick smoke" effects such as CO2 canisters.

text: Doesn't mention its effects.

refinement: QuikBlast is the ideal fluid for steam pipe and other "quick smoke" effects such as CO2 canisters creating a thick white burst of smoke.

answer: QuikBlast is ideal for creating a thick white burst of smoke and producing quick smoke effects.

answer: QuikBlast is the ideal fluid for creating quick smoke effects. It creates a thick burst of white smoke that disappears within seconds. It is great in upshots and flex foggers to create CO2 blast effects without the expensive CO2 tanks and cryojets.

answer: QuikBlast is used to create CO2 effects using a fogger without the expensive CO2 tanks and cryo jets.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Is Quikblast safe?

answer: Yes, Quikblast is safe for all applications due to its odorless and non-irritating properties. All designer select fluids from Froggys Fog are made from lab-grade UV-Filtered de-ionized water and pharmaceutical grade chemicals, each approved by the FDA.

answer: Yes. It is odourless, will not irritate and is not toxic or flammable.

text: Doesn't mention the quality of its ingredients or that they're FDA approved.

refinement: Yes. It is odourless, will not irritate and is not toxic or flammable made from lab-grade UV-Filtered de-ionized water and pharmaceutical grade chemicals, each approved by the FDA.

answer: Yes, it is safe.

text: Doesn't mention the quality of its ingredients or that they're FDA approved.

refinement: Yes, it is safe, it's made from lab-grade UV-Filtered de-ionized water and pharmaceutical grade chemicals, each approved by the FDA.

answer: Yes, all Designer Select fluids from froggys fog have been designed with the longevity of your fog and haze machine in mind. All Designer Select fluids are made with lab-grade UV-Filtered de-ionized water and pharmaceutical grade chemicals, making this fluid safe for any application.

text: Doesn't mention that the ingredients are FDA approved.

refinement: Yes, all Designer Select fluids from froggys fog have been designed with the longevity of your fog and haze machine in mind. All Designer Select fluids are made with lab-grade UV-Filtered de-ionized water and pharmaceutical grade chemicals all of which are FDA approved, making this fluid safe for any application.

answer: Yes, it is safe for any application - it is odorless, non-irritating, non-toxic, non-flammable, and leaves little to no residue.

text: Doesn't mention the quality of its ingredients or that they're FDA approved.

refinement: Yes, it is safe for any application - it is odorless, non-irritating, non-toxic, non-flammable, and leaves little to no residue. Its ingredients are made from lab-grade UV-Filtered de-ionized water and pharmaceutical grade chemicals, each approved by the FDA.

question: Write a ~3 sentence summary.

answer: QuikBlast is a fluid for steam pipe and other "quick smoke" effects such as CO2 canisters. It creates a thick burst of white smoke that rapidly dissipates, facilitating CO2 blast without de CO2. The Froggys Fog company guarantees that their fluids are designed for longevity of the fog machine based on De-Ionized Water's and Pharmaceutical Grade Chemicals.

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This document is an advertisement for a smoke/debris effect. The main product advertised is QuikBlast and it is best used for steam pipe and other smoke effects.

The document reviews the ca tagets for this product. The product is described as made from lab-grade UV-Filtered de-ionized water ,pharmaceutical grade chemicals, and comes in two "envelopes".

answer: QuikBlast is the ideal fluid for creating "quick smoke" effects such as CO2 blasts. This high density formula creates thick white bursts of smoke that dissipate quickly. Perfect for creating powerful, quick puffs of fog. This fluid is safe for any application.

text: Doesn't mention the quality of its ingredients or that they're FDA approved.

refinement: QuikBlast is the ideal fluid for creating "quick smoke" effects such as CO2 blasts. This high density formula creates thick white bursts of smoke that dissipate quickly. Perfect for creating powerful, quick puffs of fog. This fluid is safe for any application as it's made from lab-grade UV-Filtered de-ionized water and pharmaceutical grade chemicals, each approved by the FDA.

answer: QuikBlast, the fluid for steam pipe and other "quick smoke" effects such as CO2 canisters, is made from lab-grade UV-Filtered de-ionized water and pharmaceutical grade chemicals, each approved by the FDA. It adheres to the gravity and density requirements of major fog and haze machine manufacturers. It is perfect for smoke, explosion, and freezing type effects, and safe for application.

answer: QuikBlast is a water based fog fluid that is perfect for creating quick smoke effects such as in a CO2 canister. The fluid creates a thick white burst of smoke that is gone in mere seconds. This formula is great for creating puffs, blasts, and columns of fog. It is safe and odorless.

text: Doesn't mention the quality of ingredients and that they're FDA approved.

refinement: QuikBlast is a water based fog fluid that is perfect for creating quick smoke effects such as in a CO2 canister. The fluid creates a thick white burst of smoke that is gone in mere seconds. This formula is great for creating puffs, blasts, and columns of fog. It is safe and odorless, made from lab-grade UV-Filtered de-ionized water and pharmaceutical grade chemicals, each approved by the FDA.


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MONICA KATRICE ROBERTS (May 4, 1962October 5, 2020) was an African-American blogger, writer, and transgender rights advocate. She was the founding editor of _TransGriot_, a blog focusing on issues pertaining to trans women, particularly African-American and other women of color. Roberts' coverage of transgender homicide victims in the United States is credited for bringing national attention to the issue.

Early life and education

Roberts was born and raised in segregated Houston, Texas. Her mother was a schoolteacher and her father was a DJ. Roberts graduated from Jones High School in the Houston Independent School District in 1980.[1][2] In 1984, she graduated from the University of Houston.[3]

Career and activism

Roberts was working in Houston as an airline gate agent in 1993–94 when she began her gender transition.[4] She was a founding member of the National Transgender Advocacy Coalition, and served as its Lobby Chair from 1999 to 2002.[5][6] In Louisville, Kentucky, Roberts served on the board of the Fairness Campaign and its political action committee C-FAIR. In 2005 and 2006, she organized the Transsistahs-Transbrothas Conference that took place in that city.[7]

She began writing _TransGriot_ in 2004 as a newspaper column for _The Letter_, a Louisville-based LGBT newspaper;[8][9] the term “griot” refers to a storyteller from West Africa.[10] Roberts founded the _TransGriot_ blog in 2006.[11][12] Roberts was motivated by a lack of trans blogs focused on black people and other people of color.[13][14] One of the missions of her blog is to “chronicle the history of Black transpeople”.[15] The blog allowed her to address community issues in a more timely manner and allowed greater control than the column after it was taken away due to a conflict with an advertiser over her writing.[16] Through _TransGriot_, Roberts also identified transgender homicide victims in order to tribute the victims, many of whom are often misgendered in police reporting and media coverage.[17] Roberts' coverage of transgender homicides is credited for bringing national attention to the issue.[18]

As a black trans woman, Roberts has explored the intersections of cissexism and racism in her writing. In a 2009 column, she stated that people who have a problem with the word _cisgender_ “are wailing in unacknowledged cisgender privilege”, and compared this criticism to white people that “call me 'racist' anytime I criticize the underlying structural assumptions that buttress whiteness”.[19]

Awards and recognition

In 2006, Roberts won the IFGE Trinity Award for meritorious service to the transgender community; it was the transgender community's highest meritorious service award, and she was the first African-American Texan and the third African-American openly trans person to be given the award.[20] In 2015, Roberts received the Virginia Prince Transgender Pioneer Award from Fantasia Fair, making her the first African-American openly trans person to be so honored.[21][22]

In 2016, Roberts received a Special Recognition Award from GLAAD,[23] and became the first openly trans person to receive Phillips Brooks House Association's Robert Coles “Call of Service” Award.[24][25] In 2017, Roberts received the HRC John Walzel Equality Award from the Human Rights Campaign.[26]

In 2018, she was named one of “8 Houston Women to Watch on Social Media” by _Houstonia._[27] and won Outstanding Blog at the GLAAD Media Awards.[28] In January 2020, Roberts received the Susan J Hyde Award for Longevity in the Movement from the National LGBTQ Task Force.[29] In June 2020, in honor of the 50th anniversary of the first LGBTQ Pride parade, _Queerty_ named her among the fifty heroes “leading the nation toward equality, acceptance, and dignity for all people”.[30][31]

Personal life and death

Roberts began her gender transition in 1993–94.[32][33] She had felt since she was five or six that “something was different about me”, but didn't have access to black trans role models at that time (the 1970s); she felt that she would have transitioned earlier if she had.[34][35]

Roberts died on October 5, 2020.[36][37][38] Her death was announced on October 8, 2020, in a Facebook post by her friend Dee Dee Watters, and was later confirmed by the Harris County Medical Examiner and local media.[39] Roberts' death was initially reported as a hit and run case, though the medical examiner later stated that the cause of death was a “medical emergency”; her family reported that she was feeling unwell in the days prior to her death.[40] The following week, the medical examiner reported the cause of death was complications of a pulmonary embolism.[41]

Many LGBT activists, writers, and other celebrities paid tribute to Roberts via social media following the announcement of her death, including Janet Mock,[42] Raquel Willis,[43] Jen Richards,[44] Darnell L. Moore,[45] and Human Rights Campaign president Alphonso David.[46]

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title: Monica Roberts

question: Who is Monica Katrice Roberts?

answer: Monica Katrice Roberts is an African-American blogger, writer, and transgender rights advocate.

answer: Monica Katrice Roberts was an African-American blogger, writer, and transgender rights advocate.

answer: Roberts was an African-American blogger, writer, and transgender rights advocate.

answer: Monica Katrice Roberts was an African-American transgender rights advocate and blogger who founded the TransGriot blog. She was well-known for her coverage of transgender homicides, which brought national attention to the issue. Roberts died in October 2020.

text: "She was well-known for her coverage of transgender homicides, which brought national attention to the issue. Roberts died in October 2020." - this extra information can be deleted.

refinement: Monica Katrice Roberts was an African-American transgender rights advocate and blogger who founded the TransGriot blog.

question: Where and when was Roberts born?

answer: Houston, Texas, in 1962

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answer: Roberts was born in Houston, Texas in 1962.

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refinement: Roberts was born in Houston, Texas on May 4, 1962.

answer: Roberts was born in Houston, Texas on May 4, 1962, at a time of racial segregation.

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refinement: Roberts was born in Houston, Texas on May 4, 1962.

answer: Roberts was born in Houston, Texas, in 1962.

text: Use the complete date "May 4, 1962"

refinement: Roberts was born in Houston, Texas, on May 4, 1962.

question: Define the term "griot" in TransGriot.

answer: According to the passage, "griot" refers to a storyteller from West Africa.

answer: A griot is a storyteller from West Africa.

answer: A storyteller from West Africa.

answer: The term "griot" refers to a storyteller from West Africa.

question: What caused Roberts' death?

answer: Roberts died of a pulmonary embolism.

answer: According to the passage, Roberts died of a "medical emergency." The specific cause of death was later determined to be complications of a pulmonary embolism.

answer: Roberts' death was initially reported as a hit and run case, but the medical examiner later said that the cause of death was complications of a pulmonary embolism. Roberts' family also said that she was feeling unwell days prior to her death.

text: "Roberts' family also said that she was feeling unwell days prior to her death." - superfluous information that can be deleted.

refinement: Roberts' death was initially reported as a hit and run case, but the medical examiner later said that the cause of death was complications of a pulmonary embolism.

answer: Roberts' death was initially reported as a hit and run case, but the medical examiner later stated that the cause of death was a "medical emergency". The medical examiner reported the cause of death was complications of a pulmonary embolism.

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refinement: Roberts' death was initially reported as a hit and run case, but the medical examiner later stated that the cause of death was a "medical emergency" and reported the cause of death was complications of a pulmonary embolism the following week.

question: Write a ~5 sentence summary.

answer: Monica Roberts was an African-American transgender rights advocate and blogger who founded the TransGriot blog. She was well-known for her coverage of transgender homicides, and was honored with several awards for her activism. Roberts died in October 2020, and was mourned by many in the LGBT community.

text: Remove the commas in "transgender homicides," and "October 2020,"

refinement: Monica Roberts was an African-American transgender rights advocate and blogger who founded the TransGriot blog. She was well-known for her coverage of transgender homicides and was honored with several awards for her activism. Roberts died in October 2020 and was mourned by many in the LGBT community.

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Monica Roberts was an African-American transgender rights advocate and blogger who founded the TransGriot blog.
Roberts was born and raised in segregated Houston, Texas, and began her gender transition in 1993–94.
She was well-known for her coverage of transgender homicides and was honored with several awards for her activism.
Roberts died in October 2020 from complications of a pulmonary embolism.
Her death was mourned by many in the LGBT community.

answer: Monica Karice Roberts was an African-American blogger, writer, transgender rights advocate, and one of the first to focus on the plight of transgender black people and other people of color. Born in Houston, Texas during segregation, Roberts began her transition in 1993-94 and was a founding member of the National Transgender Advocacy Coalition. She was the founding editor of TransGriot, a blog focusing on issues affecting trans women of color. Roberts was credited with bringing national attention to transgender homicide victims. She died of complications from a pulmonary embolism on October 5, 2020.

answer:
Monica Katrice Roberts was an African-American blogger, writer, and transgender rights advocate. She was the founding editor of TransGriot, a blog focusing on issues pertaining to trans women, particularly African-American and other women of color. Roberts' coverage of transgender homicide victims in the United States is credited for bringing national attention to the issue.

Roberts was born and raised in segregated Houston, Texas. She was a founding member of the National Transgender Advocacy Coalition, and served as its Lobby Chair from 1999 to 2002. She began writing TransGriot in 2004 as a newspaper column for The Letter, a Louisville-based LGBT newspaper.

text: "African-American" - change to "African-Americans"

refinement:
Monica Katrice Roberts was an African-American blogger, writer, and transgender rights advocate.
She was the founding editor of TransGriot, a blog focusing on issues pertaining to trans women, particularly African-Americans and other women of color. Roberts' coverage of transgender homicide victims in the United States is credited for bringing national attention to the issue.
Roberts was born and raised in segregated Houston, Texas.
She was a founding member of the National Transgender Advocacy Coalition, and served as its Lobby Chair from 1999 to 2002.
She began writing TransGriot in 2004 as a newspaper column for The Letter, a Louisville-based LGBT newspaper.

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refinement:
Monica Katrice Roberts was an African-American blogger, writer, and transgender rights advocate.
She was the founding editor of TransGriot, a blog focusing on issues pertaining to trans women, particularly African-Americans and other women of color. Roberts' coverage of transgender homicide victims in the United States is credited for bringing national attention to the issue.
Roberts was born and raised in segregated Houston, Texas.
She was a founding member of the National Transgender Advocacy Coalition and served as its Lobby Chair from 1999 to 2002.
She began writing TransGriot in 2004 as a newspaper column for The Letter, a Louisville-based LGBT newspaper.

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refinement:
Monica Katrice Roberts was an African-American blogger, writer, and transgender rights advocate.
She was the founding editor of TransGriot, a blog focusing on issues pertaining to trans women, particularly African-Americans and other women of color. Roberts' coverage of transgender homicide victims in the United States is credited for bringing national attention to the issue.
Roberts was born and raised in segregated Houston, Texas.
She was a founding member of the National Transgender Advocacy Coalition and served as its Lobby Chair from 1999 to 2002.

answer: Monica Roberts was an African-American blogger, writer, and transgender rights advocate. She was the founding editor of _TransGriot_, a blog focusing on issues pertaining to trans women, particularly African-American and other women of color. Roberts' coverage of transgender homicide victims in the United States is credited for bringing national attention to the issue.

text: "African-American" - change to "African-Americans"

refinement: Monica Roberts was an African-American blogger, writer, and transgender rights advocate. She was the founding editor of _TransGriot_, a blog focusing on issues pertaining to trans women, particularly African-Americans and other women of color. Roberts' coverage of transgender homicide victims in the United States is credited for bringing national attention to the issue.

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refinement: Monica Roberts was an African-American blogger, writer, and transgender rights advocate. She was the founding editor of TransGriot, a blog focusing on issues pertaining to trans women, particularly African-Americans and other women of color. Roberts' coverage of transgender homicide victims in the United States is credited for bringing national attention to the issue.

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Monica Roberts was an African-American blogger, writer, and transgender rights advocate.
She was the founding editor of TransGriot, a blog focusing on issues pertaining to trans women, particularly African-Americans and other women of color.
Roberts' coverage of transgender homicide victims in the United States is credited for bringing national attention to the issue.
She won many awards for her work in the transgender community, including the IFGE Trinity Award, a Special Recognition Award from GLAAD, and the Susan J. Hyde Award for Longevity in the Movement from the National LGBTQ Task Force.
Roberts died on October 5, 2020, due to complications of a pulmonary embolism.


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_BREATHLESS_ is a studio album by American jazz trumpeter Terence Blanchard.[4] The album was released on May 26, 2015 by Blue Note Records.[5] The record also produced one single, “Soldiers”.[6]

Background

_Breathless_ features Blanchard's new band, The E-Collective, consisting of Fabian Almazan on keyboards, Charles Altura on guitar, Donald Ramsey on bass, and Oscar Seaton on drums. The album also features Maroon 5's PJ Morton on three cuts, and JRei Oliver, Terence's son, on spoken word. Blanchard explained that he and drummer Oscar Seaton, with whom he has recorded several film scores, had been talking about an album like this for years before they finally found time to record it. Like his previous album _A Tale of God's Will_, this record is also a thematic album inspired by tragedy.[7] The album title serves as a reminder of the last words said by black New Yorker Eric Garner (“I can’t breathe”) in a chokehold by a NYPD officer[8] and explores the effects of racism and the aftermath of its devastation on societies around the world.[9] _Breathless_ was nominated for 2016 Grammy Award for Best Jazz Instrumental Album.[10]

Reception

Bill Beuttler of _JazzTimes_ wrote “Blanchard’s trumpet, of course, provides scorching firepower atop the band’s assortment of infectious grooves. It may not be jazz as we know it, but it’s soulful, sophisticated and worth meeting on its own terms. And it’s good that Blanchard finally got around to it.”[11] Cormac Larkin of _The Irish Times_ commented “The spirit of Miles Davis would be hard for any American trumpeter in this genre to avoid, and there are certainly echoes of electric Miles, but perhaps also – intentionally or not – there is something more European here, reminiscent of Nils Petter Molvaer’s “future-jazz”, with the austere Nordic grooves replaced by the heat and flawless poise of some old-school jazz-funk”.[12] John Fordham of _The Guardian_ noted “It’s an uneven set, and maybe too generically funky for some jazzers, but certainly has its thrilling moments”.[13] Matt Collar of AllMusic noted “Ultimately, while Breathless is a break from the aggressive, acoustic swing that has marked much of Blanchard's career, it nonetheless retains all the jaw-dropping artistry and soulful creativity we have come to expect, albeit delivered in a vibrant, electric style”.[14] In his review for _The Buffalo News_, Jeff Simon commented, “The groove on this disc is a bore as often as not... As for consumers of groove music and hip-hop, there’s some decent jazz soloing here but nothing you can’t hear in vastly more impressive circumstances elsewhere.”[15]

Track listing

Personnel

THE E-COLLECTIVE

-   Terence Blanchard – trumpet, producer, writer (tracks: 2 4 5 7 8 9 10 12)
-   Donald Ramsey – bass
-   Oscar Seaton – drums
-   Charles Altura – guitar
-   Fabian Almazan – piano, synth

PRODUCTION

-   Don Was – A&R
-   Steve Cook – A&R, administration
-   Randall Leddy – art direction, design
-   Andrew F. Scott - cover art
-   Casey Contreary – assistant engineer
-   Frank Wolf – engineer, mixing
-   Don Was – executive producer
-   Gavin Lurssen – mastering
-   Henry Adebonojo – photography
-   Robin Burgess – producer
-   Tondrae Kemp – tour manager

Chart performance

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| Chart (2015)                      | Peak                              |
|                                   | position                          |
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| US Traditional Jazz Albums        | 7                                 |
| (_Billboard_)[16]                 |                                   |
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title: Breathless (Terence Blanchard album)

question: What is Breathless?

answer: It is a studio album by American jazz trumpeter Terence Blanchard.

text: _BREATHLESS_ is a studio album by American jazz trumpeter Terence Blanchard.

answer: Breathless is a studio album by American jazz trumpeter Terence Blanchard.

text: _BREATHLESS_ is a studio album by American jazz trumpeter Terence Blanchard.

answer: Breathless is a studio album by American jazz trumpeter Terence Blanchard.

text: _BREATHLESS_ is a studio album by American jazz trumpeter Terence Blanchard.

answer: Breathless is a jazz album by Terence Blanchard. The album features Blanchard's new band, The E-Collective, and explores the effects of racism. Breathless was nominated for a Grammy Award in 2016.

text: _BREATHLESS_ is a studio album by American jazz trumpeter Terence Blanchard.

question: Who is featured on the album?

answer: PJ Morton, Maroon 5's keyboardist, is featured on three cuts.

text: Morton isn't the only musician featured.

refinement: PJ Morton, Maroon 5's keyboardist, is featured on three cuts. JRei Oliver, Blanchard's son, is featured on a spoken word track. The E-Collective, consisting of Fabian Almazan on keyboards, Charles Altura on guitar, Donald Ramsey on bass, and Oscar Seaton on drums, are also featured.

text: _Breathless_ features Blanchard's new band, The E-Collective, consisting of Fabian Almazan on keyboards, Charles Altura on guitar, Donald Ramsey on bass, and Oscar Seaton on drums. The album also features Maroon 5's PJ Morton on three cuts, and JRei Oliver, Terence's son, on spoken word.

answer: The album features Terence Blanchard's new band, The E-Collective, consisting of Fabian Almazan on keyboards, Charles Altura on guitar, Donald Ramsey on bass, and Oscar Seaton on drums.

text: It features Terrence's son, JRei Oliver. I think the term "featured" doesn't mean they're a usual part of the band or group, so the E-Collective members are not considered to be "featured".

refinement: The album features  Blanchard's new band, The E-Collective, consisting of Fabian Almazan on keyboards, Charles Altura on guitar, Donald Ramsey on bass, and Oscar Seaton on drums. The album also features Maroon 5's PJ Morton on three cuts, and JRei Oliver, Terence's son, on spoken word.

text: The album also features Maroon 5's PJ Morton on three cuts, and JRei Oliver, Terence's son, on spoken word.

answer: The album features Fabian Almazan on keyboards, Charles Altura on guitar, Donald Ramsey on bass, and Oscar Seaton on drums.

text: It also features two other people.

refinement: The album features Fabian Almazan on keyboards, Charles Altura on guitar, Donald Ramsey on bass, and Oscar Seaton on drums. The album also features Maroon 5's PJ Morton on three cuts, and JRei Oliver, Terence's son, on spoken word.

text: Blanchard's new band, The E-Collective, consisting of Fabian Almazan on keyboards, Charles Altura on guitar, Donald Ramsey on bass, and Oscar Seaton on drums. The album also features Maroon 5's PJ Morton on three cuts, and JRei Oliver, Terence's son, on spoken word.

answer: The album features Terence Blanchard and his band, The E-Collective.

text: It also features two other people.

refinement: The album features Terence Blanchard and his band, The E-Collective. The album also features Maroon 5's PJ Morton on three cuts, and JRei Oliver, Terence's son, on spoken word.

question: What is Blanchard's previous album called?

answer: The previous album by Terence Blanchard is called _A Tale of God's Will_.

text: Like his previous album _A Tale of God's Will_, this record is also a thematic album inspired by tragedy.

answer: A Tale of God's Will

text: Like his previous album _A Tale of God's Will_, this record is also a thematic album inspired by tragedy.[

answer: A Tale of God's Will

text: Like his previous album _A Tale of God's Will_, this record is also a thematic album inspired by tragedy.[

answer: A Tale of God's Will

text: Like his previous album _A Tale of God's Will_, this record is also a thematic album inspired by tragedy.[

question: How was it recieved?

answer: _Breathless_ was well-received by critics, with many praising the album's jazz fusion sound. It was nominated for a 2016 Grammy Award for Best Jazz Instrumental Album.

text:
Reception

Bill Beuttler of _JazzTimes_ wrote “Blanchard’s trumpet, of course, provides scorching firepower atop the band’s assortment of infectious grooves. It may not be jazz as we know it, but it’s soulful, sophisticated and worth meeting on its own terms. And it’s good that Blanchard finally got around to it.”[11] Cormac Larkin of _The Irish Times_ commented “The spirit of Miles Davis would be hard for any American trumpeter in this genre to avoid, and there are certainly echoes of electric Miles, but perhaps also – intentionally or not – there is something more European here, reminiscent of Nils Petter Molvaer’s “future-jazz”, with the austere Nordic grooves replaced by the heat and flawless poise of some old-school jazz-funk”.[12] John Fordham of _The Guardian_ noted “It’s an uneven set, and maybe too generically funky for some jazzers, but certainly has its thrilling moments”.[13] Matt Collar of AllMusic noted “Ultimately, while Breathless is a break from the aggressive, acoustic swing that has marked much of Blanchard's career, it nonetheless retains all the jaw-dropping artistry and soulful creativity we have come to expect, albeit delivered in a vibrant, electric style”.[14] In his review for _The Buffalo News_, Jeff Simon commented, “The groove on this disc is a bore as often as not... As for consumers of groove music and hip-hop, there’s some decent jazz soloing here but nothing you can’t hear in vastly more impressive circumstances elsewhere.”[15]

answer: The reviews were mixed but largely positive. Comparisons were made to Miles Davis and his eclectic jazzy style was largely praised.

text:
Reception

Bill Beuttler of _JazzTimes_ wrote “Blanchard’s trumpet, of course, provides scorching firepower atop the band’s assortment of infectious grooves. It may not be jazz as we know it, but it’s soulful, sophisticated and worth meeting on its own terms. And it’s good that Blanchard finally got around to it.”[11] Cormac Larkin of _The Irish Times_ commented “The spirit of Miles Davis would be hard for any American trumpeter in this genre to avoid, and there are certainly echoes of electric Miles, but perhaps also – intentionally or not – there is something more European here, reminiscent of Nils Petter Molvaer’s “future-jazz”, with the austere Nordic grooves replaced by the heat and flawless poise of some old-school jazz-funk”.[12] John Fordham of _The Guardian_ noted “It’s an uneven set, and maybe too generically funky for some jazzers, but certainly has its thrilling moments”.[13] Matt Collar of AllMusic noted “Ultimately, while Breathless is a break from the aggressive, acoustic swing that has marked much of Blanchard's career, it nonetheless retains all the jaw-dropping artistry and soulful creativity we have come to expect, albeit delivered in a vibrant, electric style”.[14] In his review for _The Buffalo News_, Jeff Simon commented, “The groove on this disc is a bore as often as not... As for consumers of groove music and hip-hop, there’s some decent jazz soloing here but nothing you can’t hear in vastly more impressive circumstances elsewhere.”[15]

answer: The album was nominated for a Grammy Award for Best Jazz Instrumental Album.

text: I added a bit about critics' take on it.

refinement: The album was nominated for a Grammy Award for Best Jazz Instrumental Album. It received mixed reviews from critics, though more of them were on the positive side.

text:
Reception

Bill Beuttler of _JazzTimes_ wrote “Blanchard’s trumpet, of course, provides scorching firepower atop the band’s assortment of infectious grooves. It may not be jazz as we know it, but it’s soulful, sophisticated and worth meeting on its own terms. And it’s good that Blanchard finally got around to it.”[11] Cormac Larkin of _The Irish Times_ commented “The spirit of Miles Davis would be hard for any American trumpeter in this genre to avoid, and there are certainly echoes of electric Miles, but perhaps also – intentionally or not – there is something more European here, reminiscent of Nils Petter Molvaer’s “future-jazz”, with the austere Nordic grooves replaced by the heat and flawless poise of some old-school jazz-funk”.[12] John Fordham of _The Guardian_ noted “It’s an uneven set, and maybe too generically funky for some jazzers, but certainly has its thrilling moments”.[13] Matt Collar of AllMusic noted “Ultimately, while Breathless is a break from the aggressive, acoustic swing that has marked much of Blanchard's career, it nonetheless retains all the jaw-dropping artistry and soulful creativity we have come to expect, albeit delivered in a vibrant, electric style”.[14] In his review for _The Buffalo News_, Jeff Simon commented, “The groove on this disc is a bore as often as not... As for consumers of groove music and hip-hop, there’s some decent jazz soloing here but nothing you can’t hear in vastly more impressive circumstances elsewhere.”[15]

answer: It was nominated for a 2016 Grammy Award for Best Jazz Instrumental Album.

text: I added a bit about critics' take on it.

refinement: It was nominated for a 2016 Grammy Award for Best Jazz Instrumental Album. It received mixed reviews from critics, though more of them were on the positive side.

text:
Reception

Bill Beuttler of _JazzTimes_ wrote “Blanchard’s trumpet, of course, provides scorching firepower atop the band’s assortment of infectious grooves. It may not be jazz as we know it, but it’s soulful, sophisticated and worth meeting on its own terms. And it’s good that Blanchard finally got around to it.”[11] Cormac Larkin of _The Irish Times_ commented “The spirit of Miles Davis would be hard for any American trumpeter in this genre to avoid, and there are certainly echoes of electric Miles, but perhaps also – intentionally or not – there is something more European here, reminiscent of Nils Petter Molvaer’s “future-jazz”, with the austere Nordic grooves replaced by the heat and flawless poise of some old-school jazz-funk”.[12] John Fordham of _The Guardian_ noted “It’s an uneven set, and maybe too generically funky for some jazzers, but certainly has its thrilling moments”.[13] Matt Collar of AllMusic noted “Ultimately, while Breathless is a break from the aggressive, acoustic swing that has marked much of Blanchard's career, it nonetheless retains all the jaw-dropping artistry and soulful creativity we have come to expect, albeit delivered in a vibrant, electric style”.[14] In his review for _The Buffalo News_, Jeff Simon commented, “The groove on this disc is a bore as often as not... As for consumers of groove music and hip-hop, there’s some decent jazz soloing here but nothing you can’t hear in vastly more impressive circumstances elsewhere.”[15]

question: Write a ~3 sentence summary.

answer: Terrence Blanchard's new album "Breathless" has released featuring Fabian Almazan on keyboards, Charles Altura on guitar, Donald Ramsey on bass, and Oscar Seaton on drums. This is a follow up to his previous album, "A Tale of God's Will". The reception has been mixed, but largely positive, and Blanchard has drawn comparisons from critics to the spirit of Miles Davis.

answer: Breathless is a studio album by American jazz trumpeter Terence Blanchard. It was released on May 26, 2015 by Blue Note Records. The album features Blanchard's new band, The E-Collective, and was nominated for a 2016 Grammy Award for Best Jazz Instrumental Album.

answer: _Breathless_ is a jazz album by American trumpeter Terence Blanchard, featuring his new band The E-Collective. The album explores the effects of racism and the aftermath of its devastation on societies around the world. It was nominated for a 2016 Grammy Award for Best Jazz Instrumental Album.

answer: Terence Blanchard's album Breathless is a jazz album that explores the effects of racism and the aftermath of its devastation on societies around the world.

text: This needs more detais.

refinement: Terence Blanchard's album Breathless is a jazz album that explores the effects of racism and the aftermath of its devastation on societies around the world. This is a follow up to his previous album, "A Tale of God's Will". The reception has been mixed, but largely positive, and Blanchard has drawn comparisons from critics to the spirit of Miles Davis. Breathless was nominated for 2016 Grammy Award for Best Jazz Instrumental Album.


text: The first image that arises in my mind when someone mentions the word “homeland” is that of the bustling markets in India. For some people, an ideal day consists of peace, calm and serenityy: a day to unwind or perhaps just sitting in a hot tub, lounging alone. But life is not always ideal, because the world is full of opposites. Life in India thrives on society, spices, sounds, and scents. I still remember Monday as being the most exciting day of the week. I used to walk, along with my family, to an exclusive 'bazaar' open only on Mondays. As we walked down the street that would eventually lead to the bazaar, I used to feel an odd, buzzing sensation in my tummy.  "What might I see this time?” or “What do I want to buy?” were just a few questions that raced through my mind as we walked towards this immensely large and 'way-too-many-people-to-fit-in' market. We often reached the market at the "peak hour" and blended in with the hundreds of people buying vegetables, fruits and other items. We embraced ourselves as a part of the large and ever changing swarm of people in the bazaar with continuous exiting and entering. The bazaar was truly one of its kind. I first sensed the aroma and fragrance of the countless fruits and vegetables being sold. The mouth watering smell of fresh watermelons, mangoes, apricots, pears, plums and peaches is so hard to resist. The numerous people around me talking; the noise and overall feeling of non-cohesion, and yet, there existed a strong sense of unity as all the sounds blend into one background song until all you can listen to is the salesman talking and the sound of your own voice as the chorus. The various types of street foods being cooked like samosas and fried hash-browns with sauces and chutneys to go along with them. The sweet potatoes being marinated and sold with all kinds of spicy and crisp fillings; popcorn and peanuts being sold in all different kinds of ways and all this in not just one place, but all throughout the street market. As dawn approached with the rays of the sun gently fading into the night sky, the sky turned a warm orange and the stall lights turn on. An important part of the bazaar was also the most obvious, the people. There were always hundreds of people going about, whether just roaming around aimlessly or checking off items from their lists. This is what made the bazaar what it was, the diversity in that single area was more than that in most countries. The various spices, chilies, turmeric, ginger powders and concoctions being displayed in neat little mountain piles, all the while adding to the flavor and fragrances on the street. The aromatic and beautiful flowers being sold by vendors, bought to decorate homes or just to tie up in the ladies' hair. People haggling to save more and more money, not for the savings but for the satisfaction of winning. There was always a strange order amidst all the chaos and confusion. The familiar traits of the market were just like a coin, both opposing sides, yet made out of the same metal and part of the same coin. Correspondingly, the bazaar though it seemed to be full of commotion, but at its core there was harmony amongst all the different elements: the haggling, scents, groceries, etc. Even though the necessity of the bazaar was long lost, the memories that were created by it and the bonds forged made us go there every Monday as a family. This is what made it special, different than other days, it was remarkable.

title: [NF] Mondays

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about the smells in the bazaar?

answer: The narrator remembers that the Monday bazaar had a scent concoction of spices, fruits, and vegetables. A lot of the scents were a first for him. There were street food vendors, spices, chilies, and flowers mixing to create the fragrance of the street.

answer: The narrator says that he first sensed the aroma and fragrance of fruits and vegetables. The main fruits are mangoes, apricots, peaches, plums and pears. The article also mentions that other street foods were cooked like samosas and fried hash-browns.

text: The article doesn't mention the scent of the spices and flowers.

refinement: The narrator says that he first sensed the aroma and fragrance of fruits and vegetables. The main fruits are mangoes, apricots, peaches, plums and pears. The article also mentions that other street foods were cooked like samosas and fried hash-browns. Various spices contributed to the fragrances on the street, as did the aromatic flowers sold by vendors.

answer: The article states that the smells in the bazaar are one of its most unique aspects, with wonderful aromas like those of fruits, vegetables and spices. The smells remind the author of the vibrant social atmosphere of the bazaar and bring about a sense of unity in its seeming chaos.

answer: The author describes aromatic and mouth watering smells such as of fresh fruits and flowers as being among some of the many things that make Mondays special at the bazaar.

answer: The narrator recognizes the smell of fruits and vegetables as well as other smells that are familiar. The spices, chilies, turmeric, ginger powders and concoctions being sold also add to the smell a bazaar. At the end of the bazaar, flowers are also sold and add to the smells of the bazaar.