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This is only a part of either a short story, or a novel i have recently started working on. I hope you enjoy, and i love criticism, hit me with it :D

The cave was full of darkness. It clung to every crack and crevice. Black shadows upon black stones. Ériu did not think that this obscure darkness could be any colder, any more uninviting. But it was. It tore into her skin with a terrifying velocity, like black tendrils lashing her skin. Ériu was out picking vegetables and fruit like she had always done. Basket in hand and off she would trot, the gentle warmth of summer springing her step as she filled her basket with juicy strawberries and those sweet, crunchy apples mother would sometimes bake into apple pies. But there was no apple pie here, no warmth, no light, only darkness and her sad thoughts to keep her company.
How could this happen to her, it was a normal day, only she had wandered into this cave. She had never seen it before and wanted to explore the inside. She cursed her stupid curiosity, because of it, she was lost. From what she could remember, she was deep inside the cave, having slid her way down a hill of muck and tumbling rocks when the sensation began to overcome her. It stiffened her entire body and crept along her skin, slicing into her muscles and tendons, instantly rendering her nothing more than a conscious rock, much like the cold, hard rock walls that surrounded her. Only they were inanimate and dead. Before she completely blacked out, the manipulative effect had invaded her nerves, sending millions of tiny electric shocks all over her body. Every toe, every finger vibrated with a burning intensity. Tears fell from her twinkling eyes, splashing her knees as she thought about the feeling.

No, she thought, this is not the end. She grabbed one of the soggy apples that scattered the cave floor and took a huge bite out of it, ripping it almost in half. Juice dribbled down her chin.
If it was to be her demise, she would not die hungry. She devoured three more apples greedily before taking many deep breaths to calm her quivering torso. Ériu felt her way up the spiky rock wall, hand pushed hard into the slick rock to steady her own legs, still weak from the shocks that had made her pass out. She yearned for her own bed, and the soft kisses her mother would place on her forehead every night. That thought seemed to instil hope in the young girl, but Ériu knew better than to hope. Hope wouldn’t save her life, only action would. What need her of hope when she was encased in this black prison. This abyss was terminal.

There was no way of telling where she was going; she had no sense of direction or position. She could not even tell which way was forward, and which way was back. Soon, she let the darkness guide her, trusting in her instincts rather than letting fear grip hold of her, exactly what mother had always taught her to do. The sweeping abyss seemed to swallow her more as she edged her way along the cold crevice, opening up unto a beyond which seemed to swallow her more the further she walked. By now, she had quickened her pace, and was no longer scurrying along the wall like some terrified beetle. Her fingers brushed against the cave wall as she moved briskly through the darkness. She felt as if she was going to slam face first into a wall at any second, but she kept on moving, she had no intention of stopping, the only thing she had left was her ability to move and she put it to good use, walking in a straight line, seeking an end that was no more in sight than her own hand in front of her face.

Then she saw it… A dim orange glow flickered in the distance. In the darkness, it looked like Ériu was peering at lava through the tip of a needle, for some reason, she smiled when she gazed upon it. The light flickered and danced in her vision, being the first thing to tickle her senses, it sent her brain into overdrive, causing the strange hue to morph and grow, igniting into colours she never seen before. Her vision seemed to swarm with dancing images and shapes inconceivable to her young mind. Quickly, her eyes began to adjust to the warm glow of the mesmerising light and she became obsessed with it. Ériu was drawn towards not only the light, but the company light brings in the lonely despair of darkness. Suddenly, she felt hopeful again, this light would bring her home, back to mother and the warm log fire that Ériu loved nothing more than to curl up beside, feeling the warm tickle of the flame on her feet.

The ember glow was not far, and the next thing she knew, she was sprinting towards it, her face etched with a lolling smile.

Her smile melted into a wide-eyed gape when she saw what was producing the light.

A small, burning orb, about the size of a large orange hung low in the murky air. It seemed to emanate with moxie and an animated vigour as Ériu gazed, awestruck at the sight before her. She had never seen anything like this before, nor could she ever hope to again, surely she was the first person to see something like this?

“Hello,” whispered Ériu in her soft rural tone.

Soft as her voice was, it was not strong, and strength is what she needed right now.

“Hello!” she repeated. This time however, her voice was loud and clear, cutting through the shuddersome silence that engulfed the cave.
“Can you help me get home?”

Ériu nearly jumped twenty feet in the air when she heard the orb exhale with a low humming noise. Almost like a sighing bear, nestling in to hibernate out the winter. Her heart pounded even harder in her chest when the orb began to slowly drift forward. Ériu followed dutifully, her eyes fixed on the effervescent sphere of energy. Both orb and girl quickened their pace, until Ériu was tearing after the leering ball, like a child after sweets. This time, she did not care about what was ahead, or behind her, only the light and comforting heat of the xanthic orb.

Ériu let out an ear-piercing wail as colour and light exploded upon her vision. She was brought to her knees by a relentless barrage of senses the moment she emerged from the void of the hollow.

She could not believe her own two eyes as to what she was seeing before her. This was not home…This was nowhere she had ever seen before.

title: Ériu - The Spirit Princess

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does Eriu eat?

answer: She eats some apples she brought in the cave

text: "She devoured three more apples" is evidence of Eriu eating apples.

answer: Ériu eats apples in order to stay strong in the darkness of the cave. She also eats the orb, which helps her find her way out of the cave.

text: There's no evidence of Eriu eating the orb. She eats apples in the cave.

refinement: Ériu eats apples in order to stay strong in the darkness of the cave.

answer: By the time she finally emerged from the cave, Eriu ate 3 apples inside the cave.

text: It appears that she would have had four apples. "She devoured three more apples" implies she had four in total.

refinement: By the time she finally emerged from the cave, Eriu ate 4 apples inside the cave.

answer: Ériu eats fruit while lost in the cave. She eats the fruit in order to satisfy her hunger and to battle against the cold darkness that surrounds her.

text: It misses to specify that Eriu eats apples.

refinement: Ériu eats apples while lost in the cave. She eats the fruit in order to satisfy her hunger and to battle against the cold darkness that surrounds her.

answer: Apples and berries.

text: There's no evidence to suggest that Eriu eats the berries that she had picked. She eats the apples.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Where does the story take place?

answer: The story takes place in a void-like cave deep within a dark cave, which leads to a intriguing light originating from an orb of energy. The story occurs in an unknown, fantastical location.

text: The story takes place in a cave, however the answer is contradicting stating the location is unknown.

refinement: The story takes place in a void-like cave deep within a dark cave, which leads to a intriguing light originating from an orb of energy. The story occurs in an unknown, fantastical location.

answer: It's not clear, though it takes place in a pitch-black cave.

text: "The cave was full of darkness" is evidence that the story takes places in a dark cave.

answer: The story takes place in a cave deep within the darkness of an unknown abyss.

answer: Inside a dark cave

text: "The cave was full of darkness" is evidence that the story takes places in a dark cave.

answer: Inside a cave.

text: "The cave was full of darkness" is evidence that the story takes places in a cave.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who does Eriu talk to in the cave?

answer: Ériu speaks to an orb that she encounters in the darkness of the cave.

answer: She talks to her imaginary friend possessing the orb. This orb-shaped object is releasing light and heat, and she seems excited by it. However, when it speaks, she leaps several feet into the air before realizing that it's not talking to her.

text: There's no evidence that suggests Eriu has an imaginary friend.

refinement: She talks to the orb. This orb-shaped object is releasing light and heat, and she seems excited by it. However, when it speaks, she leaps several feet into the air before realizing that it's not talking to her.

answer: Ériu talks to a burning orb in the dark cave.

answer: She talks to someone she believes is in the cave.

text: There's no evidence to suggest Eriu believes there is a person inside the cave. It misses to mention she speak to an orb

refinement: She talks to an orb she sees in the cave.

answer: She talks to herself.

text: She speaks when she sees an Orb, therefore she is talking to the orb.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Where does the light come from?

answer: The light comes from an orb of fire that is hovering just ahead of the young girl.

text: "A small, burning orb" is evidence that the light comes from the burning orb.

answer: From the orb when the princess emerges from the void

answer: The light comes from a small, burning orb that floats in the air.

text: "A small, burning orb" is evidence of where the lights comes from.

answer: A magical orb of light approaches her.

text: There's no evidence to suggest the orb is magical.

answer: A burning orb becomes visible to the heroine.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Does Eriu leave the cave?

answer: She is transported to a new place by the light.

text: It misses to explicitly say she emerges from the cave.

refinement: Yes, She is transported to a new place by the light.

answer: Yes.

text: "the moment she emerged from the void of the hollow" is evidence to suggest she leaves the cave.

answer: N/A. She gets rescued by a mana orb.

text: It misses to mention that she emerges from the cave.

refinement: She emerges from the cave as she gets rescued by an orb.

answer: Yes, she does leave the cave.

text: "the moment she emerged from the void of the hollow" is evidence to suggest she leaves the cave.

answer: Yes, she leaves the cave to find something vastly different.

text: "the moment she emerged from the void of the hollow" is evidence to suggest she leaves the cave.

question: Write a ~5 sentence summary.

answer: Eriu ventures into a cave out of curiosity. It is very dark and she stumbles and becomes lost. She's afraid she's going to die when she sees some light coming from another tunnel. She calls out to anyone who can hear her. A magical orb of light approaches her and transports her to a new place.

text: There's no evidence to suggest the lights comes from a tunnel + a grammar correction.

refinement: Eriu ventures into a cave out of curiosity. It is very dark, she stumbles and becomes lost. She's afraid she's going to die but then she sees some light emit from an orb. She calls out to anyone who can hear her. The magical orb of light approaches her and transports her to a new place.

answer: Ériu enters a cavernous cave in search of treats. Lost in the darkness, she begins to hallucinate and see a large orb of light. The orb comes alive and begins to lead her back to the surface. When she exits, she finds she is not in her home anymore. She sees an entirely new landscape.

text: It misses to mention that she entered the cave out of curiosity.

refinement: Ériu enters a cavernous cave out of curiosity. Lost in the darkness, she begins to hallucinate and see a large orb of light. The orb comes alive and begins to lead her back to the surface. When she exits, she finds she is not in her home anymore. She sees an entirely new landscape.

text: There's no evidence to suggest that she is hallucinating.

refinement: Ériu enters a cavernous cave out of curiosity. Lost in the darkness, she sees a large orb of light. The orb comes alive and begins to lead her back to the surface. When she exits, she finds she is not in her home anymore. She sees an entirely new landscape.

answer: Ériu finds herself lost in a cavernous cave, overcome by a strange energy. The only source of light she finds is a fiery orb which leads her back towards the surface. When she emerges from the cave, she finds herself in a fantastical new world she has never seen before.

text: Misses to include some relevant details to reach the targeted the summary length.

refinement: Ériu finds herself lost in a cavernous cave, overcome by a strange energy. The only source of light is a burning orb. She tries to talk to it and follows it which leads her back towards the surface. When she emerges from the cave, she can't believe her eyes. She finds herself in a fantastical new world she has never seen before.

answer: Ériu is being attacked by some inherent energy inside a cave. Eriu tries to calm her mind before realizing the only way to get out of the cave is to move, so she starts walking towards a little light, eating the fruits she has with her. As she approaches what appears to be lava, she tries to talk to it and turn it to her advantage until she emerges to a world she has never seen before.

text: There's no evidence to suggest Eriu is being attacked.

refinement: Ériu is being overcome by some inherent energy inside a cave. Eriu tries to calm her mind before realizing the only way to get out of the cave is to move. She starts walking towards a little light, eating the fruits she has with her. As she approaches what appears to be lava, she tries to talk to it and follows it. She emerges to a world she has never seen before.

answer: Ériu is in the cave when she is attacked by a manipulative effect that stiffens her muscles and sends electric shocks everywhere. She devours several apples to find the strength to move on. As she runs after the ball of light, she reaches a warm glow. She emerges from the void of the hollow and blasts into an orb with color and light. She is horrified to learn she is nowhere she has ever seen before.

text: There's no evidence to suggest Eriu is being attacked.

refinement: Ériu is in the cave when she is overcome by a manipulative effect that stiffens her muscles and sends electric shocks everywhere. She devours several apples to find the strength to move on. As she runs after the ball of light, she reaches a warm glow. She emerges from the void of the hollow and blasts into an orb with color and light. She is horrified to learn she is nowhere she has ever seen before.

text: There is no evidence to suggest Eriu is horrified when she emerges.

refinement: Ériu is in the cave when she is overcome by a manipulative effect that stiffens her muscles and sends electric shocks everywhere. She devours several apples to find the strength to move on. As she runs after the ball of light, she reaches a warm glow. She emerges from the void of the hollow and blasts into an orb with color and light. She can't believe her eyes when she emerges to a place she has ever seen before.


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text:
You talked, we listened... The world of IT and enterprise development and your needs are rapidly changing. In a cloud first, mobile first world you need:

-   The broadest range of learning opportunities across the breadth of Microsoft's technologies and solutions
-   Technical education, product evaluation and deep hands-on learning to plan, architect, deploy, manage, and secure a connected enterprise
-   More access to senior technology leaders and engineers doing coding every day to get your questions answered
-   A greater understanding of future technology vision and roadmap to help you be successful
-   Greater community interaction with technology professionals and your industry peers in structured and informal settings
-   Epic after hour gatherings where you can unwind and turn on the fun with your peers!

We're excited to announce the inaugural unified Microsoft commercial technology event the week of May 4, 2015.

If you've attended TechEd or Microsoft Management Summit, this is THE place for you to be. It's everything you've come to know and love and more. You'll find what you're familiar with and you'll learn more about Lync, Microsoft Azure, Microsoft Exchange, Office 365, Project, SharePoint, SQL Server, System Center, Visio, Visual Studio, Windows, Windows Intune, Windows Server and lots more.

Save the week of May 4, 2015.  We'll be back in September with more details. See you in Chicago for this unparalleled event.

Follow TechEd on Facebook, Twitter and subscribe to the TechEd Insiders Newsletter for event updates.

This change only affects events scheduled in calendar year 2015. This year, TechEd Europe in Barcelona 28-31 October, will proceed as planned.

To be clear, TECHED LIVES ON. This event will be a part of and an enhancement of TechEd, co locating with that event to ensure the world of IT gets optimal access to all of the best resources in one place.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What is the Microsoft commercial technology event week about?

answer: What this weeks-long IT event focuses on is for anyone familiar with TechEd, as well as Lync, Microsoft Azure, Microsoft Exchange, Office 365, Project SharePoint, SQL Server, System Center, Visio, Visual Studio, Windows, Windows Intune, Windows Server and such.

text: The Microsoft commercial technology event week is focused on providing technical education, product evaluation, and hands-on learning opportunities for enterprise development across the breadth of Microsoft's technologies.

refinement: The Microsoft commercial technology event week is focused on providing technical education, product evaluation, and hands-on learning opportunities for enterprise development across the breadth of Microsoft's technologies.

answer: The inaugural Microsoft commercial technology event is for those who want to learn more about Microsoft technologies. This event is co-located alongside TechEd, with its purpose being to provide IT professionals with the broadest range of learning opportunities across the breadth of Microsoft's technologies and solutions.

answer: It is for those interested in technical education as well as those interested in understanding future technology roadmap, among other things.

answer: The Microsoft commercial technology event week is focused on providing technical education, product evaluation, and hands-on learning opportunities for enterprise development across the breadth of Microsoft's technologies.

answer: The Microsoft commercial technology event week is for enterprise in the go.

text: The Microsoft commercial technology event week is focused on providing technical education, product evaluation, and hands-on learning opportunities for enterprise development across the breadth of Microsoft's technologies.

refinement: The Microsoft commercial technology event week is focused on providing technical education, product evaluation, and hands-on learning opportunities for enterprise development across the breadth of Microsoft's technologies.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

When is the event taking place?

answer: The event will take place the week of May 4, 2015.

answer: The inaugural unified Microsoft commercial technology event is taking place the week of May 4, 2015.

answer: The week of May 4, 2015.

answer: Fourth of May, 2015.

answer: May 4, 2015

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How does this new Microsoft event affect future TechEd events?

answer: Some of the TechEd events will be co-located with the new event, to ensure the world of IT gets optimal access to all of the best resources in one place.

answer: No, it does not. There will still be future TechEd events held in various locations around the world.

text: Not a yes no q

refinement: This new Microsoft event replaces TechEd events beginning in 2015. The annual TechEd Europe event will proceed as planned.

answer: This new Microsoft event is an enhancement of TechEd events scheduled in calendar year 2015. The existing TechEd Europe event in Barcelona on October 28-31 will proceed as planned.

answer: This new Microsoft event replaces TechEd events beginning in 2015. The annual TechEd Europe event will proceed as planned.

answer: The article does not state.

text: This new Microsoft event replaces TechEd events beginning in 2015. The annual TechEd Europe event will proceed as planned.

refinement: This new Microsoft event replaces TechEd events beginning in 2015. The annual TechEd Europe event will proceed as planned.

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: Microsoft is merging TechEd with Microsoft Management Summit to create an all-in-one commercial technology event taking place in May 2015. This event will include everything you loved about TechEd and more, including Microsoft Azure, Office 365, SQL Server, Windows Intune and lots more.

answer: The day before the official CMS announcements at Build, Jeffrey Snover issued an email that seemed to be a reassurance to all those who have spent money and time learning and working at the context of traditional certifications and events. Microsoft's commercial technology event will co-locate with TechEd and be a part of and an enhancement to HackEd.

answer: The new Microsoft commercial technology event week will focus on future technological roadmap, community interactions with leading technology professionals and more access to software engineers. This new event does not replace or affect any other events hosted by Microsoft.

answer: Microsoft is introducing a consolidated event, the Microsoft Commercial Technology Event, to coincide with TechEd events this year. This event will showcase products and services across Microsoft and is intended to be a more comprehensive learning resource for enterprise technology decision makers.

answer: This is a letter from an official at Microsoft. The letter details Microsoft's plans to merge Tech Ed with Microsoft Management Summit.


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5G is the Holy Grail of the telecom industry. It will enable the future of technology, providing the foundation not just for faster downloads but for leveraging the entire Internet of Things (IoT), from smart toasters to sensor-enabled manufacturing to self-driving cars. And right now, the driving force is a legion of forward-thinking leaders. These are the executives and managers who are pushing digitization at their organizations in order to remain viable in a competitive, global environment. To support them, to fuel business innovation —and the economy — we need 5G and we need it now!

But we don’t just need 5G. In the global arena, we need to dominate 5G just as American telecom companies have dominated 4G. The stakes are too high to lose our leading edge in this industry. That’s especially true since there’s another entire dimension to this discussion, and that’s power.

As you’ll see below, the evolution of 5G networks is also the evolution of global economic power as well as political influence. So when it comes down to it, our IT workforce will play a pivotal role in the nation’s ability to remain among the world’s top powerhouses. Are we ready?

The Race to Lead the World in 5G: Critical in More Ways Than Most People Know

In an era where technology is inextricably intertwined with economics and national security, it matters greatly just who owns 5G. On a national level, leaders are concerned with mergers, takeovers, and foreign investment, eyeing everything carefully lest U.S.-based companies’ ability to dominate 5G becomes threatened.

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In Tech, Innovation Wins the Race

Soon, the need for 5G infrastructure development will be massive. To get rolling with 5G, we’re talking large-scale investment by telecom companies to the tune of tens of billions of dollars. Some of that will go to patent-producing research but eventually, funds will go toward creating the infrastructure that’s necessary to support the new networks.

Money is only part of the equation in winning this global race. Companies will need to foster innovation if they want to help the U.S. maintain a position of strength in the tech world. But no matter who wins the 5G tech race, the IT workforce — the field engineers, for example — must stand ready to take up the baton for the next stage of the relay. That means becoming more agile.

It can also mean going freelance. As most IT professionals are already aware, the use of third-party IT services is on the rise. Individual departments yearn for a more personalized, user-friendly approach to IT and they’re turning to cloud-based services to get it.

SaaS companies often thrive by tapping into a global network of independent workers — many of whom have shifted away from traditional “IT Department” jobs to become part of a growing, agile, remote workforce. This is happening in the telecom sector too, where the need for engineers and others essential to building the 5G infrastructure can expand and contract quickly and dramatically.

Once 5G is enabled, this trend will blossom even further, gaining maximum momentum.

To Prepare for the Era of 5G, the IT Workforce Must Become Agile

To compete with the rest of the world, companies need a malleable IT workforce, one that can quickly scale up or down as needs change. One that can quickly learn new technologies, new processes, and other requirements of a fast-paced, mobile environment.

Everyone is busy adapting, growing, and benefitting from the internet…so should those who enable it. Becoming agile is everyone’s job nowadays, including those in IT — even the field engineers. It’s how innovation takes place and it’s how we’ll eventually become the leaders in the race to implement 5G.

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question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about why the 5G is a necessity?

answer: The author is optimistic that the 5G network is necessary, given the novelty and essentiality of telecommunications in the global arena. In light of that, the United States needs to dominate it and deliver. This is why the interested parties are willing to invest billions of dollars to roll out the infrastructure to support the new networks.

text: The answer provided does not answer the question.

text: The answer doesn't mention the listed benefits of 5G.

refinement: According to the article, 5G will enable faster downloads and will leverage the entire Internet of Things, from smart toasters to self-driving cars.

text: The article also states that 5G is needed to attain global economic power and political influence.

refinement: According to the article, 5G will enable faster downloads and will leverage the entire Internet of Things, from smart toasters to self-driving cars. 5G is also crucial for attaining global economic power and political influence.

answer: The text states that 5G is critical for the future of technology, for leveraging the technology of the Internet of Things, for economic competitiveness, and for maintaining U.S. influence in the tech world. 5G is necessary to prepare for a fast-paced, mobile environment where innovation and agility are necessary.

answer: The text is kind of vague, many of the usual benefits were thrown out there including increased speed, increased bandwidth and devices, 5G being a critical part of the IoT, and being an overall foundation piece of current and future technology, along with security implications, the opportunity cost of not advancing 5G beyond 4G, and a burgeoning economy that requires digital infrastructure to run.

text: The phrasing of this answer lacks coherence.

refinement: 5G will allow for increased speed and increased bandwidth and devices. 5G is aso a critical part of the Internet of Things, and an overall foundation piece of current and future technology. It has security  and economical implications.

answer: The text says that 5G networks are critical in order to remain competitive and amid a global environment. It matters greatly just who owns 5G because 5G will enable faster download speeds, development of IoT tech, and economic and political influence. In order to prepare for 5G, the IT workforce must become agile to take up the baton for the next phase of the relay.

answer: 5G network puts a lot of industries in the forefront of their business through its massive benefits over the 4G network. It makes for easier and quicker access to the internet, manufacturing self-driving cars to smart toasters, etc. The evolution of 5G networks is also the evolution of global economic power and political influence. It gives rise to a more advanced means and advantage of handling national security, securing foreign deals, and ensuring a more stable economy.

text: Omits mention of faster download speeds and the IoT.

refinement: 5G network puts a lot of industries in the forefront of their business through its massive benefits over the 4G network. It makes for easier and quicker access to the internet, manufacturing self-driving cars to smart toasters, etc. It will allow for faster download speeds and for managing the entire Internet of Things. The evolution of 5G networks is also the evolution of global economic power and political influence. It gives rise to a more advanced means and advantage of handling national security, securing foreign deals, and ensuring a more stable economy.


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(stylized as _BEATMANIAIIDX_) is a music video game developed by Bemani and published by Konami, released in Japan on February 26, 1999. The objective is to perform songs using a controller with seven keys and a turntable. After the surprise success of _Beatmania_, Benami conceived _IIDX_ to simulate an actual disc jockey (DJ) live performance. Its cabinet contains a widescreen monitor, massive speakers, and eight spotlights. Bemani later developed several updated versions of _IIDX_ to increased success. The game retrospectively received a positive reception from video game publications for its gameplay and increased difficulty. A sequel, _Beatmania III_, was released in 2000.

Gameplay

[Gameplay of _Beatmania IIDX_ during the M-Flo song “The Theme from Flo Jack”.] The objective of _Beatmania IIDX_ is to perform songs using a controller with seven key buttons and a scratchable turntable. Hitting notes with accurate timing increases the score and groove gauge bar, allowing the player to finish the stage. Failing to do so depletes the gauge and can prematurely end the song.[1][2] _IIDX_ has four play modes: 4 Keys, 5 Keys, 7 Keys, and Expert. The controls in 4 Keys mode are limited to only the white buttons.[3] 5 Keys is a mode where the player uses “3 white keys on bottom and 2 black keys on top” as in _Beatmania_.[4][5] 7 Keys utilizes all buttons[6] and Expert has the player select a course and obtain the highest score. Clearing four or more stages in Internet Ranking results in a password, which can be submitted to Konami so that the player's score is registered and shown in worldwide rankings.[7]

Development and release

In 1997, Konami distributed its Games & Music Division's (G.M.D.) _Beatmania_ in Japan as an arcade DJ simulator, significantly influencing rhythm games. Its surprise success prompted the developer to rename itself Bemani, a portmanteau of the game's title, and the studio made other music-themed video games following its release, including _Pop'n Music_ and _Dance Dance Revolution_.[8][9] Bemani conceived _Beatmania IIDX_ as a sequel to _Beatmania_. They designed it to simulate the experience of a real DJ performing songs live at a music venue, and gave it a “club Visual Jockey feel.” The game was released on February 26, 1999. While its predecessor used five keys, the _IIDX_ controller had seven. The controller was one of components used in the game's Benami Twinkle cabinet, along with a large 40-inch widescreen monitor, massive speakers, eight spotlights, and the Effect Fader (located in the control panel), the last of which is used to alter the sound during gameplay.[10]

Reception and legacy

Neil Foster, writing for the website Hardcore Gaming 101, noticed that player one's controller had the turntable relocated to the left side, which was advantageous to “some players.” He commented that with the addition of a widescreen monitor, the black keys were given easily identifiable lanes. He called the game “a rocky start” for the _Beatmania IIDX_ series, since it had music from _Beatmania_{{'}}s first two iterations (_1st Mix_ and _2nd Mix_) paired with new songs and remixes. According to Foster, many players were initially not impressed with performing old songs on upgraded hardware, so they switched to _Beatmania 4th Mix_.[11] Bryn Williams of GameSpy found _IIDX_ harder than the original _Beatmania_, because songs that take advantage of its seven keys have more notes than those made for five keys.[12] IGN's Chris Roper wrote that it was successful because of its distinctive and responsive controller. He opinioned that the controller was imperfectly designed, yet its implementation made the game a rare experience.[13]

Bemani developed several updates to the game after its release. Konami decided to link _Beatmania IIDX Club Version_ (later _Substream_) cabinets with _Dance Dance Revolution 2ndMix_ machines for simultaneous play, leading to increased success. In late 1999, the publisher hired artist Goli to design graphics and characters for _Beatmania IIDX 2nd Style_.[14] Featuring a new visual theme, _3rd Style_ was ported to the PlayStation 2.[15] In 2002, _8th Style_ was released after the discontinuation of the original _Beatmania_. Foster stated these updates popularized _IIDX_ to the point it overshadowed its predecessor, as the game not only earned more new songs, but became very difficult.[16] A sequel with a five-key controller, _Beatmania III_, was released in 2000.[17]

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title: Beatmania IIDX (video game)

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Despite the commercial and critical success of Beatmania IIDX, what are the main criticisms levelled against it?

answer:
Beatmania IIX is a sequel to Beatmania, a music video game released in 1999 by Bemani. The game requires players to perform songs using a controller with seven keys and a turntable, turning players into a virtual DJ. The more accurately the player hit the keynotes, the more points they get.

Beatmania IIDX received a positive reception by gamers and critics, influencing subsequent rhythm games. Despite the reception, some critics say that the game favors some players due to the position of the turntable. Some also criticized its level of difficulty, saying it was too complex for the controller compared to its predecessor.

text: The response includes extraneous information that is not useful for the task.

refinement: Beatmania IIDX received a positive reception by gamers and critics, influencing subsequent rhythm games. Despite the reception, some critics say that the game favors some players due to the position of the turntable. Some also criticized its level of difficulty, saying it was too complex for the controller compared to its predecessor.

answer: The game was criticised for its not very impressive visuals and aesthetic despite the great dancer's background sounds.

text: The response fails to mention that some critics say that the game favors some players due to the position of the turntable.

refinement: The game was criticized for favoring some players due to the position of the turntable.

answer: The main criticisms levelled against _Beatmania IIDX_ are that its gameplay is overly difficult compared to its predecessor, only select songs have been improved by an upgraded hardware, and its controller is imperfectly designed.

text: The response fails to mention that some critics say that the game favors some players due to the position of the turntable.

refinement: The main criticisms leveled against _Beatmania IIDX_ are that its gameplay favors some players due to the position of the turntable, only select songs have been improved by an upgraded hardware, and its controller is imperfectly designed.

answer: The lack of long term interest in the game is the most common critique. The same songs, even with duplicates, do little to promote continued interest in the game.

text: The response fails to mention that some critics say that the game favors some players due to the position of the turntable.

refinement: The play of the game favors some players due to the position of the turntable on the left side. The lack of long term interest in the game is a common critique. The same songs, even with duplicates, do little to promote continued interest in the game.

answer: The main criticisms levelled against Beatmania IIDX are primarily related to its increased difficulty and less responsive controller. Specifically, the 7-key controller has more notes in songs than the original 5-key controller, making the game harder. Furthermore, the controller is imperfectly designed and interactions with it may be less precise.

text: The controller was actually mentioned to be more responsive and the game received a positive reception for its increased difficulty.

refinement: Furthermore, the controller is imperfectly designed and interactions with it may be less precise.

text: The response misses to mention that the game favors some players due to the position of the turntable on the left side.

refinement: The game is criticized because it's claimed to favor some players due to the position of the turntable being on the left side. Furthermore, the controller is imperfectly designed and interactions with it may be less precise.


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I was born full-blooded princess with a bit of fairy powers. I was raised in an intricate stone four-story palace. My room was on the top floor. It had a pink Fisher Price vanity set and an extravagant tunnel cage for my dwarf hamster, Muffin. Along the wall I had a bay window, where I could look out and see the vast and perfectly groomed ground below. I was a powerful and graceful princess, who had everything ever needed. In this Kingdom I grew into a Queen, I was taught to be full of knowledge and love.

My father was the mighty King. He had a grand office and would care for every guest. My home had many rooms to explore. The basement was a dungeon; I was never allowed to go down the elevator. The dim chapel was great for hide and seek with my three siblings. The oval arrangement room with deep red satin chairs was the ideal place to read The Box Car Children in peace. Men would tend to the grounds and maids would dust the cherrywood stair railing. My father's guard, Steve, was a terrific man. He always worked on certificates and ascended to the basement. Occasionally, he snuck me dark chocolates from his suit pocket to satisfy my young, sweet tooth then press his finger to his smile, swearing me to secrecy.,

The castle was magical. Each morning it would fill with guest who had traveled from all walks of life in search of my father’s compassionate care. The visitors were remarkable; they always had a different age, race, shape, and size, as if they were from another land. The one common thread among them was that they always seemed so dense and weighted down by something depressing. As if the wicked White Witch from Narnia had cast them into a land of perpetual winter. My father, in his Kingly responsibility, would help them in their desperate state. They would always depart hugging my father and express gratitude to my mother for her hospitality. I believed my father had a power that could save people from anything.

The palace  was widely known for curing people who had a particular dark enchantment, the one where a body could fall into a deep slumber and never wake from it. My father would lay the individual in a beautiful personalized bed. We had a room specifically for the beds. The family would find that perfect one to help the cursed be cured. No sleeping beauty would ever stay long, because my father was mastered in his task. Each day before I would walk to school, I would pat their beds and tell them to sleep good. My proper mom would kindly correct, "Well, sleep well."

At school my best friend was Rachel. She lived in a boring suburb with her mom and brother. Although she was not a full princess, she was a faithful friend with true potential at eventually living as a royal. We would paint each other’s nails, watch princess Disney movies, and practice walking upright with books on our head. We shared a common goal in becoming Queens one day, marrying a cootie free Prince and having a castle of our own.

I love my childhood. I have no clue what made me fully believe that I was a whimsical princess. I suppose I was caught in pure bliss from my ignorance and youth. Perhaps I was hopeful that my books and Disney movies were real. Time and reality have revealed many truths to me. I came to realize I was raised in the loft of a funeral home, where my father helped the grieving memorialize their loved ones. Despite the truths, I still want to retain my prior lookout of life. I still love to look deep into rooms and search for the secrets and comforts they hold. My parents are still hardworking and loving people. Reality doesn't have to strip away beliefs that are rightfully mine. It simply adds credibility to those beliefs. I will always be a Mortician's Princess.

title: Mortician's Princess. My first post and hopefully more to come. Comments welcome!

question: Where is the princess' mother?

answer: The princess' mother is in the castle.

text: The answer should acknowledge the plot twist at the end, where the narrator explains that she was raised in a funeral home. The answer should be given in that context.

refinement: The princess is a Mortician's daughter, who was raised in a funeral home. Her mother is at home, the princess's "castle".

answer: The princess' mother is likely to be running the household, taking care of the children, and helping her husband with his work.

text: The answer should acknowledge the plot twist at the end, where the narrator explains that she was raised in a funeral home. The answer should be given in that context.

refinement: The princess is a Mortician's daughter, who was raised in a funeral home. Her mother is likely to be running the household, taking care of the children, and helping her husband with his work.

answer: She helped out her husband at the funeral home.

text: The answer should acknowledge the plot twist at the end, where the narrator explains that she was raised in a funeral home. The answer should be given in that context.

refinement: The princess is a Mortician's daughter, who was raised in a funeral home. Her mother helped out her husband at the funeral home.

answer: She is mentioned but not described.

text: Despite the lack of description, a good answer can still be given. This answer should be rewritten.

refinement: The princess is a Mortician's daughter, who was raised in a funeral home. Her mother is likely to be running the household, taking care of the children, and helping her husband with his work.

question: Why was the princess never allowed to go to the dungeon?

answer: The princess was never allowed to go to the dungeon because it was used as a dungeon for prisoners.

text: The narrator explains at the end that she was raised in a funeral home. She wasn't an actual princess in a castle.

refinement: The princess was never allowed to go to the dungeon probably because it was used by her father to take care of dead people's bodies since he was a mortician.

answer: The princess was never allowed to go to the dungeon because it was a dungeon.

text: The narrator explains at the end that she was raised in a funeral home. She wasn't an actual princess in a castle.

refinement: The princess was never allowed to go to the dungeon probably because it was used by her father to take care of dead people's bodies since he was a mortician.

answer: The princess was never allowed to go to the dungeon because it was a dungeon.

text: The narrator explains at the end that she was raised in a funeral home. She wasn't an actual princess in a castle.

refinement: The princess was never allowed to go to the dungeon probably because it was used by her father to take care of dead people's bodies since he was a mortician.

answer: The "dungeon" is actually a metaphor for the mortician's embalming room.

text: The answer should point out that "embalming room" is a guess while mentioning why it's a good one.

refinement: The "dungeon" is probably a metaphor for the mortician's embalming room since the narrator explains at the end that she was raised in a funeral home.

question: Why is she called a Mortician's princess?

answer: She was raised in a funeral home.

text: "I came to realize I was raised in the loft of a funeral home"

answer: She does not actually live in a castle, she had just romanticized living in the loft of a Mortician.

text: "I came to realize I was raised in the loft of a funeral home"

answer: The author was raised in a funeral home, where her father helped grieving people. This is why she refers to herself as a "Mortician's Princess."

text: "I came to realize I was raised in the loft of a funeral home"

answer: She was raised in a funeral home.

text: "I came to realize I was raised in the loft of a funeral home"

question: What is the dark enchantment?

answer: The dark enchantment is death, specifically when someone falls into a deep slumber and never wakes up.

text: The answer should point out that "death" is a guess for what the dark enchantment is. But it's a good one because of the plot twist at the end.

refinement: The narrator explains at the end that she was raised in a funeral home, and being a princess is the romanticization of her childhood. Thus, the dark enchantment is probably death, specifically when someone falls into a deep slumber and never wakes up.

answer: The dark enchantment is when a body falls into a deep slumber and never wakes from it.

text: The dark enchantment refers to death. The answer should point out that "death" is a guess for what the dark enchantment is. But it's a good one because of the plot twist at the end.

refinement: The narrator explains at the end that she was raised in a funeral home, and being a princess is the romanticization of her childhood. Thus, the dark enchantment is probably death, specifically when someone falls into a deep slumber and never wakes up.

answer: The dark enchantment is a curse that causes a body to fall into a deep slumber and never wake from it.

text: The dark enchantment refers to death. The answer should point out that "death" is a guess for what the dark enchantment is. But it's a good one because of the plot twist at the end.

refinement: The narrator explains at the end that she was raised in a funeral home, and being a princess is the romanticization of her childhood. Thus, the dark enchantment is probably death, specifically when someone falls into a deep slumber and never wakes up.

answer: The "dark enchantment" is actually a metaphor for death.

text: The answer should point out that "death" is a guess for what the dark enchantment is. But it's a good one because of the plot twist at the end.

refinement: The narrator explains at the end that she was raised in a funeral home, and being a princess is the romanticization of her childhood. The "dark enchantment" is actually a metaphor for death.

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: The narrator is a princess who lives in a castle with her father, the King. She believes she is a princess, but she is actually raised in a funeral home.

text: Princess: "I was born full-blooded princess with a bit of fairy powers."

text: Father King: "My father was the mighty King."

text: Funeral home: "I came to realize I was raised in the loft of a funeral home, where my father helped the grieving memorialize their loved ones."

answer: The author was born into a royal family, but as she grew up, she realized that her family was actually a mortician's family. She still loves her childhood and the memories she has of it.

text: Princess: "I was born full-blooded princess with a bit of fairy powers."

text: Funeral home: "I came to realize I was raised in the loft of a funeral home, where my father helped the grieving memorialize their loved ones."

text: Happy memories: "Despite the truths, I still want to retain my prior lookout of life. ... Reality doesn't have to strip away beliefs that are rightfully mine. It simply adds credibility to those beliefs. I will always be a Mortician's Princess."

answer: The narrator romanticizes growing up in the loft of a funeral home. She believed she was a full-blooded princess who grew up in a castle whose King (the mortician) helped cure people of the dark enchantment curse that put people into deep slumber (death).

text: Funeral home: "I came to realize I was raised in the loft of a funeral home, where my father helped the grieving memorialize their loved ones."

text: Believed she was a princess: "I love my childhood. I have no clue what made me fully believe that I was a whimsical princess."

text: Curing the dark enchantment: "The palace was widely known for curing people who had a particular dark enchantment, the one where a body could fall into a deep slumber and never wake from it. My father would lay the individual in a beautiful personalized bed."

answer: The author was raised in a funeral home, believing she was a princess. However, she eventually realized that her home was actually a funeral home, and that she was not a princess. Despite this, she still loves her childhood memories and believes that she is still a "Mortician's Princess."

text: The question asks for 2 sentences while the answer has 3. Since the second sentence mostly repeats the information in the first, it should be removed.

refinement: The author was raised in a funeral home, believing she was a princess. Despite this, she still loves her childhood memories and believes that she is still a "Mortician's Princess."

text: Funeral home: "I came to realize I was raised in the loft of a funeral home, where my father helped the grieving memorialize their loved ones."

text: Believed she was a princess: "I love my childhood. I have no clue what made me fully believe that I was a whimsical princess."

text: Mortician's princess: "I will always be a Mortician's Princess."


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[York, England] PERCIVAL LEVETT (1560–1625) was an early merchant and innkeeper of York, England, Sheriff of the city,[1] member of the Eastland Company and father of English explorer Capt. Christopher Levett.

Levett was born in Harewood, Yorkshire, and removed early to the city of York, where he was listed as a freeman in 1581, and where he served the city as chamberlain and subsequently Sheriff in 1597.[2] His daughter Ann married another York Sheriff, Christopher Topham (father of Member of Parliament Christopher Topham), and on his death married Dr. Joseph Micklethwaite.[3][4]

The ancestors of Percival Levett came from Bolton Percy, Yorkshire, and they shared a coat-of-arms with the Levetts of Normanton,[5] High Melton and Hooton Levitt, Yorkshire, indicating that a cadet branch of the family probably relocated to Bolton Percy during medieval times.[6]

Levett was a contributor from York to the Queen's Loan in 1590.[7] He was a member of the Eastland Company,[8] an English company established in the sixteenth century in an attempt to wrest Baltic trade from the Hanseatic League.

Percival Levett was buried at St. Martin's Micklegate in York on 13 February 1625.[9] Levett had done well enough as a merchant to acquire the title of gentleman, a title he assuredly was born without,[10] and sold his home in Coppergate, in central York, to Matthew Hutton, Archbishop of York.[11] Levett's sons, aside from Capt. Christopher the explorer, also became merchants, including his son Percival, a merchant at Beverley and York.[12][13] Percival Levett's brother Richard Levett was a long-serving mayor of Doncaster, South Yorkshire. [Ancestry of Percival Levett of York, Visitation of Dorset, 1623]

[1] _History and description of the ancient city of York_, William Hargrove, William Alexander, York, 1818.

[2] _Walks through the city of York, by R. Davies, ed. by his widow_, Robert Davies, Chapman and Hall Limited, London, 1880

[3] The Register of Burials in York Minster, Robert H. Skaife, The Mount, York, GENUKI.ORG

[4] [https://books.google.com/books?id=1DEGAAAAQAAJ&pg=PA367&lpg=PA367&dq=levett+peerage&source=bl&ots=iB9F0hUX01&sig=DOoUIPH2KcDIchG5iFTziXjFs0M&hl=en&ei=lTsjS-SVH4iOtAOZ3fjgDg&sa=X&oi=book_result&ct=result&resnum=10&ved=0CCwQ6AEwCTgK#v=onepage&q=&f=false A Genealogical History of the Dormant, Abeyant, Forfeited and Extinct Peerages of the British Empire, Sir Bernard Burke, Printed by Harrison, London, 1866]

[5] Miscellanea Genealogica et Heraldica, Vol. I, Third Series, G. Milner-Gibson-Cullum, Mitchell and Hughes, London, 1896

[6] The arms of the Levetts of Bolton Percy (and subsequently of York) and those of the Levetts of Normanton and High Melton were: Sable, a fess embattled, between 3 lions' heads erased, argent.1

[7] Chapters in the History of Yorkshire, James Joel Cartwright, B.W. Allen, Wakefield, 1872

[8] The Acts and Ordinances of the Eastland Company, Maud Sellers, Offices of the Royal Historical Society, London, 1906

[9] The New England Historical and Genealogical Register, Henry Fitz-Gilbert Waters, Vol. LXVII, Published by the Society, Boston, 1913

[10] In deeds of covenant of about 1590, 'Percyvall Levitt' is referred to as 'yeoman.'2 By 20 May 1617, referring to Levett and his 'son and heir Christopher,' Percival Levett is referred to as 'Gentleman.'

[11] Archaeologia Aeliana, or Miscellaneous Tracts Relating to Antiquity, Vol. V, Society of Antiquaries of Newcastle-Upon-Tyne, J.G. Forster, 1861

[12] 'Percivallus Levett, mercator, fil. Percivalli Levett, generosi,' Register of the Freemen of the City of York: Vol. 2: 1559-1759, Francis Collins, 1900, British History Online

[13] The Publications of the Surtees Society, Wills & Administrations from the Knaresborough Court Rolls, Vol. II, Published for the Society by Andrews & Co., Durham, 1905

title: Percival Levett

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about Levett's family history?

answer: Levett is the son of hardworking merchants in the village of Harewood. He is listed as a freeman in York under Robert Dudley in 1581 and then served the city as chamberlain and sheriff in 1597.  He married Alice Broster.

text: This response does not describe Levett's family history and needs to be re-written.

refinement: Levett is the son of hardworking merchants in the village of Harewood. The ancestors of Levett came from Bolton Percy, Yorkshire and shared a coat-of-arms with the Levetts of Normanton, High Melton, and Hooton Levitt.

answer: His ancestors came from the Yorkshire city of Bolton Percy. His ancestor moved early to York. Levett's children made their way in the world as merchants, including his son, who was a merchant at Beverley. His brother was a mayor of Doncaster.

answer: Percival Levett was born in Harewood, Yorkshire and was related to the Levetts of Normanton, Yorkshire. Levett was a member of the Eastland Company and a freeman of York. Levett achieved the status of gentleman and sold his home in Coppergate, in central York, to Matthew Hutton, Archbishop of York. Levett's sons all became merchants, including Christopher Levett who was an explorer.

answer: His ancestors were from Bolton Percy, Yorkshire. They are a cadet branch of the Levetts of Normanton, High Melton, and Hooton Levitt, Yorkshire, which is indicated by their shared coat-of-arms. His parents weren't nobility or rich.

answer: Percival Levett was born in Harewood, Yorkshire and moved to York where he became the Sheriff of the city. Levett is of a family that shared a coat-of-arms with other Levetts in Yorkshire, indicating that they descended from a cadet branch of the family that relocated to Bolton Percy during medieval times. Levett was a member of the Eastland Company, an English company established in the sixteenth century to wrest Baltic trade from the Hanseatic League, and he was referred to as 'Gentleman' in later deeds of covenant. In addition, his sons, including Christopher the explorer, became merchants and Levett's brother Richard was the mayor of Doncaster.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about Levett's legacy?

answer: Percival Levett was a successful merchant and an influential city official in York. His sons followed in his footsteps and became merchants, as did his grandson Christopher Levett, who became an explorer. Overall, Levett's legacy is that he was a critical figure in the business and civic life of York.

text: The part in the response that says "as did his grandson Christopher Levett" should be omitted.

refinement: Percival Levett was a successful merchant and an influential city official in York. His sons followed in his footsteps and became merchants, as did Christopher Levett, who became an explorer. Overall, Levett's legacy is that he was a critical figure in the business and civic life of York.

answer: Levett was born into privilege but eventually made his own way in the world as a merchant and became a member of the Eastland Company. Upon his death, he was recognized as gentleman. His descendants also made their mark as merchants and one of his sons, Capt. Christopher Levett, became an explorer.

answer: Levett was a successful merchant, evidenced by his earning the title of gentleman. After a career of being a merchant and innkeeper, he served as the Sheriff of York. He was also a member of the Eastland company. In 1590, he contributed to the Queen's Loan. Levett's sons also became merchants except for one, Captain Christopher Levett, who became an explorer.

answer: Levett was a merchant and hosted several positions during his tenure, including serving as Sheriff and becoming a gentleman by buying a home. His son was also a merchant like his father though Christopher Levett is mostly known for being an explorer. His other son and daughter inherited his business. Another nephew of Levett's, Richard Levett, was a mayor. Overall Levett clearly had a lasting influence that overshadowed the rest of his descendants in some form of commerce.

answer: Levett's life was almost unremarkable, outside of being a well-respected merchant and city official. He dealt with more common tradespeople, ran a hotel and brewery, and left records of his family line. His family members married well, producing another member of the bourgeoisie.

text: This response has a more overall perception of Levett's legacy than describing what is told in the story. Describing what is told in the story, like Levett's sons and how Christopher became an explorer are important details to be told.

refinement: Levett was a successful merchant, evidenced by his earning the title of gentleman. After a career of being a merchant and innkeeper, he served as the Sheriff of York. He was also a member of the Eastland company. In 1590, he contributed to the Queen's Loan. Levett's sons also became merchants except for one, Captain Christopher Levett, who became an explorer.


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California posted the biggest job gains in the nation during August while unemployment rates in California and Los Angeles County remained stuck at their July level, the Employment Development Department said Friday.

Between July and August the state added 44,200 jobs, the EDD said, and it has added 313,900 jobs over the past 12 months, a growth rate of 2.1 percent. That outpaces the nation’s growth rate of 1.8 percent.

“It’s by far the best in the nation,” said economist Stephen Levy, director of the Center for the Continuing Study of the California Economy in Palo Alto. “There is no question that we slid into a deep hole and this is a slow recovery. But Southern California and the state are now both outpacing the nation. This is a good report.”

Last month’s job increase means that the state has now added just more than 1.4 million jobs since February 2010, when the jobless rate peaked at 12.4 percent.

Last month, California’s jobless rate remained at 7.4 percent for the third consecutive month but it is down from 8.9 percent a year ago.

Los Angeles County’s rate remained at 8.1 percent, down from 9.9 percent a year earlier.

The jobless rate in the Inland Empire was 8.7 percent in August versus 9.3 percent in July and 10.5 percent a year ago.

But all three areas had a higher rate than the nation, which was 6.1 percent last month.

“The state, which suffered much larger job losses than the nation, has finally caught up by steadily outpacing the nation in job growth since 2010. The results for both the state and nation are disappointing compared to the growth normally associated with recoveries and the growth needed to bring unemployment securely below 6 percent,” Levy said.

At the state level, nine categories added jobs over the month. The biggest gain came in construction, which added 13,600 jobs.

Two categories — trade, transportation and utilities and information — shed 8,300 jobs between July and August.

Los Angeles County also saw robust gains, adding 17,600 jobs between July and August. The biggest gain was 7,400 in the education and health services sector.

Over the past 12 months the county has added 69,100 jobs, or a growth rate of 1.7 percent.

Both the L.A. County and Inland Empire are making good strides, said Kimberly Ritter-Martinez, an economist at the Los Angeles County Economic Development Corporation.

“It was a solid report. We saw some big decreases (in the jobless rates) from a year ago,” she said.

One good sign is that the construction sector, badly battered during the Great Recession, is up 5.6 percent year-over-year at both the state and county level.

“That tells us activity has picked up. We are seeing some more new home construction and (building) permits but it is still below the levels before the recession,” Ritter-Martinez said.

New home building is concentrated in the Antelope Valley and Inland Empire.

The latter is now fully participating in the recovery, she said, with the region adding 9,900 jobs between July and August.

“Over the past couple of months, it has gone from being one of the slowest growing regions to one of the fastest. It’s finally kicking back into gear,” Ritter-Martinez said.

question: What state posted the biggest job gains in the nation during August and how many jobs were added?

answer: California posted the biggest job gains by adding 44,200 jobs between July and August.

text: 'Between July and August the state added 44,200 jobs' is evidence of the quantity

text: 'California posted the biggest job gains in the nation during August' is evidence of teh state

answer: According to the passage, California was the state that posted the biggest job gains in the nation during August, adding 44,200 jobs.

text: 'was the state that' could be removed

refinement: According to the passage, California posted the biggest job gains in the nation during August, adding 44,200 jobs.

text: 'California posted the biggest job gains in the nation'

text: 'Between July and August the state added 44,200 jobs'

answer: California posted the biggest job gains in the nation during August and added 44,200 jobs.

text: 'Between July and August the state added 44,200 jobs'

answer: California added 44,200 jobs in August.

text: 'Between July and August the state added 44,200 jobs'

question: What is California's growth rate over the past 12 months?

answer: According to the passage, California's growth rate over the past 12 months is 2.1 percent.

text: 'and it has added 313,900 jobs over the past 12 months, a growth rate of 2.1 percent'

answer: 2.1%

text: "and it has added 313,900 jobs over the past 12 months, a growth rate of 2.1 percent"

answer: 2.1 percent

text: "and it has added 313,900 jobs over the past 12 months, a growth rate of 2.1 percent"

answer: 2.1%

text: "and it has added 313,900 jobs over the past 12 months, a growth rate of 2.1 percent"

question: What sector is up after getting battered by the Great Recession and how many jobs were added?

answer: The construction sector is up 5.6 percent year-over-year at both the state and county level.

text: Doesn' note how many jobs were added

refinement: The construction sector is up 5.6 percent year-over-year at both the state and county level (~13,600 jobs).

text: 'One good sign is that the construction sector, badly battered during the Great Recession, is up 5.6 percent year-over-year at both the state and county level.'

answer: According to the passage, construction is up 5.6 percent year-over-year at both the state and county level. Over the past 12 months, construction has added 13,600 jobs in the state and 7,400 jobs in Los Angeles County.

text: 'Over the past 12 months, construction has added 13,600 jobs in the state and 7,400 jobs in Los Angeles County.'

text: 'One good sign is that the construction sector, badly battered during the Great Recession, is up 5.6 percent year-over-year at both the state and county level.'

answer: Construction is up 5.6% year-over-year at both the state and county level.

text: Doesn't note how many jobs were added

refinement: Construction is up 5.6% year-over-year at both the state and county level, adding 13,600 jobs.

answer: The construction sector is up 5.6 percent and added 13,600 jobs.

question: How many jobs did California add since 2010?

answer: California added 1.4 million jobs since 2010.

text: 'Last month’s job increase means that the state has now added just more than 1.4 million jobs since February 2010, when the jobless rate peaked at 12.4 percent.'

answer: 1.4 million

text: 'Last month’s job increase means that the state has now added just more than 1.4 million jobs since February 2010, when the jobless rate peaked at 12.4 percent.'

answer: According to the passage, since February 2010, California has added 1.4 million jobs.

text: 'Last month’s job increase means that the state has now added just more than 1.4 million jobs since February 2010, when the jobless rate peaked at 12.4 percent.'

answer: Since February 2010, California has added 1.4 million jobs.

text: 'Last month’s job increase means that the state has now added just more than 1.4 million jobs since February 2010, when the jobless rate peaked at 12.4 percent.'

question: Write a ~3 sentence summary.

answer: California posted the biggest job gains in the nation during August while unemployment rates in California and Los Angeles County remained stuck at their July level. The state added 44,200 jobs, the EDD said, and it has added 313,900 jobs over the past 12 months, a growth rate of 2.1 percent. The jobless rate in the Inland Empire was 8.7 percent in August versus 9.3 percent in July and 10.5 percent a year ago.

text: 'California posted the biggest job gains in the nation during August while unemployment rates in California and Los Angeles County remained stuck at their July level, the Employment Development Department said Friday.'

text: 'Between July and August the state added 44,200 jobs, the EDD said, and it has added 313,900 jobs over the past 12 months, a growth rate of 2.1 percent.'

answer: California posted the biggest job increase in America during August, adding 44,200 jobs between July and August. The state's 2.1 percent growth rate outpaced the nation's 1.8 percent. The biggest gains were seen in the construction sector, which added 13,600 jobs.

answer: California's jobless rate remained at 7.4 percent for the third consecutive month but it is down from 8.9 percent a year ago.

text: The main point of the article is the job gains. 'California posted the biggest job gains in the nation during August while unemployment rates in California and Los Angeles County remained stuck at their July level' could be added.

refinement: California posted the biggest job gains in the nation during August while unemployment rates in California and Los Angeles County remained stuck at their July level. California's jobless rate remained at 7.4 percent for the third consecutive month but it is down from 8.9 percent a year ago.

text: Mentioning that education, health services, and construction represent a big portion of the gains.

refinement: California posted the biggest job gains in the nation during August while unemployment rates in California and Los Angeles County remained stuck at their July level. California's jobless rate remained at 7.4 percent for the third consecutive month but it is down from 8.9 percent a year ago. Gains have been made in education, health services, and construction.

answer: According to the article, California's job growth rate is the highest in the nation, with 313,900 jobs added over the past 12 months. Los Angeles County and the Inland Empire also saw job growth, with the construction sector seeing an increase in activity.

text: Health services and education also experienced large gains.

refinement: According to the article, California's job growth rate is the highest in the nation, with 313,900 jobs added over the past 12 months. Los Angeles County and the Inland Empire also saw job growth, with the construction sector seeing an increase in activity. The health services and education sectors also experienced large gains.


text:
This is my first attempt which I'm writing for a school assessment. Some feedback would be good. I honestly don't know if the story is any good or not so please be as blunt as you like and thank you for reading:

A meal of chicken, cabbage, carrot and cauliflower was served. An average day had just occurred and the daily ritual of illusive unity was required to replenish the family of five. Each food had a particular taste but they were all better with a little bit of salt to add some flavour, not too much though. The meal was different without it but it could still be enjoyed.

December. The heat had begun to sear, the unpleasant feeling it was. Forcing itself upon you frequently throughout your life, no consideration or care. The diversity of the flock in the pickup area was large but individualised groups had still formed. Surrounding her were three members of the opposite gender, decent people who liked to have a laugh. They would consider her a friend. She never really felt connected to them, but appearing social was beneficial. One dreaded aspect of her life was put on hold for another as father’s car rolled forward to greet her. A crumpled suit wore father as sweat perspired down his worn out, tired face. The door closed.
“Who were those buffoons you were with?”
“My friends” she lied.
His opprobrium was visible, “You may think they’re you’re friends but it’s not what they want.”
“Bu-“
“They’re just whippersnappers trying to impress you darling…”
A long speech in which Eve said nothing ensued. It was about boys, then kids your age, then what Eve should be doing with her life, then maturity, then complaining about his co-workers’ laziness, then about himself when he was a young man. He almost sounded like a preacher at your door.

January. Pressure was constant. Different depending on time and location but everlasting nonetheless. Pressures are contemporary with other pressures and feel free to build upon themselves until they tumble over one another. Social conformity is one pressure, grades are another. Eve’s grades had come in. The grades were slightly above average. Understandably mother was upset. She probably assumed the grades were due to how shut off she was. Always in her room. Door closed, music on. That’s no way for someone to live. She should be out in the world; exploring, socialising, learning, exercising. All these things for a healthy soul. That’s what mother thought.
“You’re walking on thin ice darling. These grades are too low if you want to do something with your life.” she said accusingly.
“I’m trying.” she lied.
“Well not quite hard enough.” she stated in a friendly-sounding, offensive-meaning tone, “You’re locked up in your room too much. You should do your homework out here were we can chat. It would be fun.”
Her mouth could have been mistaken for a waterfall as a series of botched ideas, false studies and emotional lies fell out of her mouth.

February. A slow current passed through the desolate creek. The water often deviated and formed streams travelling in different directions, these streams all joined back together in the end. Eve got a small splinter yesterday running her hand along the trees, it was too small to worry about at the time but the throbbing was now noticeable. The end of the creek drew near as civilisation began to peak through in the form of a street. Fellow students walked past on their way to the common location. Among them was her brother, Brandon. The dreary look on Eve’s face was ignored as he noticed her picking at her hand. A smile crept upon his face.
“Great! You’ve got a splinter, does it hurt?”
“No” she lied.
“Bullshit, you were always a tough one. I know this fancy way to remove it.”
He continued going on about stealing some baking soda from the food class to make some mixture held against my hand with a band-aid. Though once walking continued, his pace increased and Eve’s didn’t.

March. Showers are peaceful. For those pleasant ten minutes you get to forget yourself to the warm embrace of the water streaming down from your head. It’s almost like you’re non-existent. Your worries are reduced to a single obsolete privilege of cleaning yourself. You become unhygienic when dirt builds up. It gets worse as time goes on. All it takes is a simple shower to become clean again, though sometimes a shower isn't always available. Jane was currently doing something unimportant to raise her social status in her head making the bathroom occupied. You could hear her on the phone spewing out nonsense about sticking up for a friend that slept with a now previous friend’s boyfriend. This continued going on and on, supporting a friend’s misdoings through false justification. It was about twenty minutes before Eve interrupted.
“We did a cancer fundraiser for when she got cancer, I can’t believe she’s pulling this on us.”
“Hey Jane. Could you please hurry up in there? I’ve been waiting for five minutes.” she lied.
The door opened moments later as rushed speech was spoken, “Sorry, sorry, sorry. People have been terrible. You’re lucky you don’t have so-called friends.”
She left in a hurry but her words remained with Eve. They stuck despite all her best efforts to wash them away.

The meal of chicken, cabbage, carrot and cauliflower was standard. It certainly wasn’t bad. It’s just that the same form of dish with different foods is served every night. The taste is somewhat different but it’s always just food fulfilling its universal purpose as fuel. The individual food item retains its constant, unchanging flavour over time despite how it’s presented. Eve went to her room. The family doesn't have dinner with salt anymore.

title: Salt

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the events of December.

answer: Eve's grades come in and her mother is upset with them. She lies to her father about her friends though Brandon helps remove a splinter. Jane interrupts Eve while she is showering making her feel bad about her friends' misdoings. Despite her best efforts, the words stick with her. Despite all this, the meal of chicken, cabbage, carrot and cauliflower is standard.

text: This is a description of January.

refinement: Eve is waiting to be picked up and stands with a trio of boys that consider her a friend, but who she doesn't really feel connected to.  Her father arrives, upset to have seen her hanging out with them, and gives her a speech about boys and other facets of life, sounding like a preacher.

answer: Eve sits in the pickup with a trio of boys. Her father arrives, upset to have seen her hanging out with them, and gives her a speech about boys.

text: Eve does not sit "in the pickup with a trio of boys". She's waiting to be picked up and stands with this trio that consider her a friend, but who she doesn't really feel connected to.

refinement: Eve is waiting to be picked up and stands with this trio of boys that consider her a friend, but who she doesn't really feel connected to.  Her father arrives, upset to have seen her hanging out with them, and gives her a speech about boys.

text: Eve's father lectures to her about more than just boys, and she likens him to a preacher.

refinement: Eve is waiting to be picked up and stands with this trio of boys that consider her a friend, but who she doesn't really feel connected to.  Her father arrives, upset to have seen her hanging out with them, and gives her a speech about boys and other facets of life, sounding like a preacher.

answer: In December, Eve's grades come in and they are slightly above average. Her mom warns her that she is walking on thin ice, and unless her grades improve, she will not be able to do anything in her life. Eve's mom wants her to make friends and do her homework out there. She says the kids her age think she is dorky. Eve goes to school. Her brother envies her because she doesn't have friends, while Eve thinks he was just trying to make her feel better about not having any friends.

text: This is a description of January.

refinement: Eve is waiting to be picked up and stands with a trio of boys that consider her a friend, but who she doesn't really feel connected to.  Her father arrives, upset to have seen her hanging out with them, and gives her a speech about boys and other facets of life, sounding like a preacher.

answer: Father brings Eve home from being friends with the boys she likes, scolds her for it, and goes to talk to her for hours.

text: This is phrased strangely. "Father brings Eve home from being friends with the boys she likes". It is also inaccufrate because Eve isn't really friends with them or like them.

refinement: scolds her for it, and goes to talk to her for hours.

text: It's omitted that Eve stands next to a trio of boys, who like her but she doesn't really like back, while waiting to be picked by her dad.

refinement: Eve stands next to a trio of boys while waiting to be picked by her dad. They like her, but she doesn't really feel connected to them. scolds her for it, and goes to talk to her for hours.

text: Her father doesn't talk to her for hours. It's just a long speech.

refinement: Eve stands next to a trio of boys while waiting to be picked by her dad. They like her, but she doesn't really feel connected to them. scolds her for it, and gives her a long speech

text: The pick up scene is omitted.

refinement: Eve stands next to a trio of boys while waiting to be picked by her dad. They like her, but she doesn't really feel connected to them. Her father picks her up and scolds her for hanging with those boys, and gives her a long speech on a multitude of subjects.

answer: In December, Eve meets up with some male acquaintances at the pickup area. Her father arrives, and admonishes her for associating with what he views as a bad influence. Eve is worried about her grades, which come in below expectations. Her mother reprimands her and tells her to be more social. Eve is then interrupted in the bathroom by Jane, who has some disdainful gossip about friends. Eve realizes she's unhappy about these social norms.

text: Everything following "bad influence" is a description of January and needs to be omitted.

refinement: In December, Eve meets up with some male acquaintances at the pickup area. Her father arrives, and admonishes her for associating with what he views as a bad influence.

text: It's omitted that her father lectures her on a multitude of things on the car ride home, and sounds like a preacher.

refinement: In December, Eve meets up with some male acquaintances at the pickup area. Her father arrives, and admonishes her for associating with what he views as a bad influence. Her father lectures her on a multitude of things on the car ride home, and sounds like a preacher.

text: It's omitted that Eve doesn't really feel connected to the boys.

refinement: In December, Eve meets up with some male acquaintances at the pickup area. Eve doesn't really feel connected to them. Her father arrives, and admonishes her for associating with what he views as a bad influence. Her father lectures her on a multitude of things on the car ride home, and sounds like a preacher.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who is the protagonist of the story?

answer: Eve.

answer: The protagonist of the story is Eve.

answer: Eve, a 16-year-old girl.

text: It's not said anywhere in the text that Eve is 16. This should be omitted.

answer: Eve.

answer: The protagonist of this story is Eve.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why did Eve's family stop having dinner with salt?

answer: They didn't say.

answer: That isn't explained.

answer: Eve's family stopped having dinner with salt because they found it wasn't necessary to have salt to make the meal palatable. The other ingredients in the meal already added flavour. They stopped using salt out of convenience.

text: This is too speculative. It's not stated why or even implied why the family stopped using salt.

answer: She is no longer part of the family or the meal.

text: This is false. She is still part of the family and went back to her room after the meal.

answer: Eve's family stopped having dinner with salt because their family doesn't believe salt adds flavor to their dishes. Even without salt, the food can still be enjoyed. Eve went to her room and found the bathroom occupied due to Jane's friends antics. She lied about needing to use the bathroom to make Jane hurry up. Jane apologized but Eve became more aware of her friends' wrongdoing. This made her want to withdraw from social gatherings and refrain from adding any extra flavor for herself.

text: This is too speculative. It's not stated why or even implied why the family stopped using salt. Also, the part about Jane is irrelevant to the question.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why is Eve's mother upset?

answer: Eve's grades are below average

text: Eve's grades were "slightly above average".

answer: Because Eve's grades were only slightly above average. She assumes Eve's grades are due to how shut off Eve is.

answer: Eve's mother is upset because Eve's grades are below average. Her mother worries that if she doesn't improve her grades, she won't be able to achieve her potential in life.

text: Eve's grades were "slightly above average".

refinement: Eve's mother is upset because Eve's grades are slightly above average. Her mother worries that if she doesn't improve her grades, she won't be able to achieve her potential in life.

answer: Because her grades were much less than average.

text: Eve's grades were "slightly above average".

refinement: Because her grades were slightly above average.

answer: The mother is upset because Eve's grades are too low and she is not socializing enough.

text: "She should be out in the world; exploring, socialising, learning, exercising. All these things for a healthy soul. That’s what mother thought."

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Describe Eve's relationship with Jane.

answer: They are roommates and Jane has borrowed Eve's towel. Eve doesn't like Jane. It seems Eve is upset after overhearing Jane gossiping with one of her friends.

text: It's never stated the specific relationship between Eve and Jane. They're probably sisters, not roommates. It would be better to omit "roommate".

refinement: They may be sisters. and Jane has borrowed Eve's towel. Eve doesn't like Jane. It seems Eve is upset after overhearing Jane gossiping with one of her friends.

text: "Jane has borrowed Eve's towel" is false. There is no mention of a towel in the story.

refinement: They may be sisters. Eve doesn't like Jane. It seems Eve is upset after overhearing Jane gossiping with one of her friends.

text: It's not clear if Eve dislikes Jane. It only seems that she is annoyed.

refinement: They may be sisters. Eve is irritated by Jane. It seems Eve is upset after overhearing Jane gossiping with one of her friends.

text: It's not clear if Eve is upset by Jane's gossiping, but she is upset when Jane alludes to Eve not having friends.

refinement: They may be sisters. Eve is irritated by Jane. It seems Eve is upset after Jane insinuates Eve doesn't have friends.

answer: Eve feels resentment towards Jane for being judgmental. She perceives Jane as being self-absorbed, particularly in moments when Jane is speaking on the phone. Despite Eve acknowledging Jane's faults, Eve still values Jane as a friend.

text: All of this is far too speculative, and doesn't hint at how Jane and Eve may know each other (presumably sisters)

refinement: It's possible Eve and Jane could be sisters. Eve seems annoyed by Jane while waiting her to finish a shower. She is upset after Jane insinuates Eve doesn't have friends.

answer: They are neighbors; Eve is upset at Jane, who's been keeping Eve waiting in the bathroom for a while.

text: If they were neighbors, it doesn't make sense why Eve would be waiting for Jane to get out of the shower so she can get in. They're more likely sisters, despite this not being stated in the text.

refinement: It's possible that they are sisters. Eve is upset at Jane, who's been keeping Eve waiting in the bathroom for a while.

text: It's omitted that Eve is upset when Jane insinuates she doesn't have friends.

refinement: It's possible that they are sisters. Eve is upset at Jane, who's been keeping Eve waiting in the bathroom for a while. Jane insinuates to Eve that she doesn't have friends, which sticks with EVe.

answer: Jane is a classmate of Eve's.

text: The relationship between Jane and Eve isn't stated in the text, but it could be presumed they're sisters.

text: It's omitted that Eve is irritated waiting for Jane to get out of the shower.

refinement: It's possible they are sisters. Eve is irritated waiting for Jane to get out of the shower.

text: It's omitted that Eve is upset after Jane insinuates Eve doesn't have friends.

refinement: It's possible they are sisters. Eve is irritated waiting for Jane to get out of the shower. Eve is upset after Jane insinuates Eve doesn't have friends.

answer: Eve's relationship with Jane is tense. Jane likes to gossip and Eve often interrupts Jane in the bathroom to demand Jane hurry up. Eve dislikes Jane's constant justification of her friend's misdoings. Eve just sees Jane as a chatterbox with no regard for morals.

text: It would be better to clarify that it seems that Eve and Jane's relationship seems tense in the moment. It's not clear if it's always like this.

refinement: Eve's relationship with Jane is tense at the moment. Jane likes to gossip and Eve often interrupts Jane in the bathroom to demand Jane hurry up. Eve dislikes Jane's constant justification of her friend's misdoings. Eve just sees Jane as a chatterbox with no regard for morals.

text: There's no mention of "constant" in the story, so it would better to remove that speculation and just talk about the scene at hand.

refinement: Eve's relationship with Jane is tense at the moment. Jane likes to gossip and Eve interrupts Jane in the bathroom to demand Jane hurry up. Eve dislikes Jane's justification of her friend's misdoings. Eve just sees Jane as a chatterbox with no regard for morals.

text: The given info of Eve's opinions of Jane are too speculative. It would be better to omit this.

refinement: Eve's relationship with Jane is tense at the moment. Jane is gossiping gossip and Eve interrupts Jane in the bathroom to demand Jane hurry up. Eve notes Jane's justification of her friend's misdoings.

text: It's omitted that Jane insinuates that Eve doesn't have friends, which Eve can't forget.

refinement: Eve's relationship with Jane is tense at the moment. Jane is gossiping gossip and Eve interrupts Jane in the bathroom to demand Jane hurry up. Eve notes Jane's justification of her friend's misdoings. Jane insinuates that Eve doesn't have friends, which Eve can't forget.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: Eve's family often eats dinner with a bit of salt added. Eve interacts with boys her age, to her father's chagrin, and her grades are only slightly above average, which upsets her mother. Eve is mostly shut off from the world and doesn't have any friends. Eventually, her family stops having salt with dinner.

text: That Eve's life is described in little monthly vignettes is omitted. The salt sentence could be omitted for space.

refinement: In December, Eve is lectured by her father when he picks her up from school and noticed her standing with some boys. Eve interacts with boys her age, to her father's chagrin, and her grades are only slightly above average, which upsets her mother. Eve is mostly shut off from the world and doesn't have any friends. Eventually, her family stops having salt with dinner.

text: It's omitted that the little bit of salt makes the dish better

refinement: In December, Eve is lectured by her father when he picks her up from school and noticed her standing with some boys, who she describes as friends in a lie. Eve interacts with boys her age, to her father's chagrin, and her grades are only slightly above average, which upsets her mother. In January, Eve is lectured by her mother for her disappointing grades and social isolation. Eve is mostly shut off from the world and doesn't have any friends. Eventually, her family stops having salt with dinner.

text: Remove "Eve interacts", to make space for January and the dropping grades/isolation theme.

refinement: In December, Eve is lectured by her father when he picks her up from school and noticed her standing with some boys, who she describes as friends in a lie. In January, Eve is lectured by her mother for her disappointing grades and social isolation. Eve is mostly shut off from the world and doesn't have any friends. Eventually, her family stops having salt with dinner.

text: Omit "Eve is mostly shut off..." to make room for February.

refinement: In December, Eve is lectured by her father when he picks her up from school and noticed her standing with some boys, who she describes as friends in a lie. In January, Eve is lectured by her mother for her disappointing grades and social isolation. In February, her brother Brandon notes that she has always been a tough one in regards to her lying about the splinter in her finger hurting. Eventually, her family stops having salt with dinner.

text: Combine the salt commentary with the March vignette.

refinement: In December, Eve is lectured by her father when he picks her up from school and noticed her standing with some boys, who she describes as friends in a lie. In January, Eve is lectured by her mother for her disappointing grades and social isolation. In February, her brother Brandon notes that she has always been a tough one in regards to her lying about the splinter in her finger hurting. In March, her sister notes that Eve doesn't have friends, and her family stops having salt with dinner, which Eve used to think made dinner better.

answer: Eve's family stopped using salt in their meals due to pressure from her father. She spends time alone in her room, and things without salt begin to lose their flavour. One day, someone takes her spot in the bathroom, and she becomes angry. Eventually, she returns to normal and realises how important salt is in life.

text: This summary gets the story wrong. The story isn't all about salt and how its absence affects Eve. The story is a description of Eve's life over a period of four months.

refinement: In December, Eve is lectured by her father when he picks her up from school and noticed her standing with some boys, who she describes as friends in a lie. In January, Eve is lectured by her mother for her disappointing grades and social isolation. In February, her brother Brandon notes that she has always been a tough one in regards to her lying about the splinter in her finger hurting. In March, her sister notes that Eve doesn't have friends, and her family stops having salt with dinner, which Eve used to think made dinner better.

answer: Evie's family is facing pressure. Her brother teases her that she's been hanging out with the wrong crowd. Her mother wants her to do more than just close her door, study, and socialize. At the end of the month, Jane, her roommate, steals the bathroom while she's waving her warning that she's sick of horrible friends.

text: This summary is incorrect and inaccurate. The main character is Eve, not Evie. Her father is the one who criticizes who she hangs out with. Her mother wants her to socialize. Jane is probably her sister, and the main issue is that Jane notes that Eve doesn't have friends.

refinement: In December, Eve is lectured by her father when he picks her up from school and noticed her standing with some boys, who she describes as friends in a lie. In January, Eve is lectured by her mother for her disappointing grades and social isolation. In February, her brother Brandon notes that she has always been a tough one in regards to her lying about the splinter in her finger hurting. In March, her sister notes that Eve doesn't have friends, and her family stops having salt with dinner, which Eve used to think made dinner better.

answer: Eve's family enjoys meals together but without their usual salt. Eve has recently stopped bringing the salt over to the table and her grades have dropped. Her mother pressures her to be a better student while her brother helps fix her stubborn splinter. Eve learns that even something as small as salt can influence a lot in life.

text: This summary gets the story wrong. The story isn't all about salt and how its absence affects Eve. The story is a description of Eve's life over a period of four months.

refinement: In December, Eve is lectured by her father when he picks her up from school and noticed her standing with some boys, who she describes as friends in a lie. In January, Eve is lectured by her mother for her disappointing grades and social isolation. In February, her brother Brandon notes that she has always been a tough one in regards to her lying about the splinter in her finger hurting. In March, her sister notes that Eve doesn't have friends, and her family stops having salt with dinner, which Eve used to think made dinner better.

answer: Episodes are collected in about a month. Each episode sets a different atmosphere. Eve seems to be isolated from her friends and family. She doesn't seem to fulfill their expectations. Although the themes are different, the food barely differs amongst each episode.

text: This summary should go into a little more detail about the "episodes".

refinement: Monthly episodes from December to March are detailed about Eve's life. Eve faces criticisim from her mom, dad, and sister during these months. Eve seems to be isolated from her friends and family. She doesn't seem to fulfill their expectations. Although the themes are different, the food barely differs amongst each episode.

text: The third and fourth sentence could be combined.

refinement: Monthly episodes from December to March are detailed about Eve's life. Eve faces criticism from her mom, dad, and sister during these months. Eve seems to be isolated from her friends and family, and doesn't seem to fulfill their expectations. Although the themes are different, the food barely differs amongst each episode.

text: The final sentence is false. Rewrite it to describe how salt was taken from dinner.

refinement: Monthly episodes from December to March are detailed about Eve's life. Eve faces criticism from her mom, dad, and sister during these months. Eve seems to be isolated from her friends and family, and doesn't seem to fulfill their expectations. After March, salt is removed from the family's dinner, which once used to be something Eve enjoyed.