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[Unlearning savior complex]

You need to save the world (not really). As a Christian, I was taught to save my friends from hell by converting them. As a man, I was taught that I need to take care of women because they can’t take care of themselves. As a citizen of the United States of America, I was taught that our military must protect the world from violence. Who were you taught to save?

The desire to “save” works its way into all social change movements. Save poor people from hunger, saves developing nations from lack of water, save souls from hell.

When making a movement, you will feel the itch to build your movement upon saving the world. Resist this temptation. You can’t change the world.

Why unlearn the savior complex?

The notion that we, that I, that you, need to save anyone from anything rests on two unproven assumptions:

1.  Those people cannot save themselves
2.  What we do is actually helpful

There is a saying, “I speak for those who cannot speak for themselves.” Have you said that? I have. Nonsense. Everyone can communicate. Maybe we are not listening. Maybe there is too much noise for others to be heard. Maybe you have grabbed the microphone away and won’t let go.

Poor people can, and do, create solutions to eliminate poverty. Slaves can, and do, free themselves from slavery. Queer people can, and do, love themselves, create faith communities, and form families. Women can, and do, vote and educate themselves. Instead of saving, stop oppressing.

The best solutions come from the people directly affected by the issue at hand. If you really do have a heart for the poor, terrific! Work with poor people rather than trying to save them. If you really do want to love gay people, great! Support gay people and their organizations rather than trying to speak for them.

What happens when we don’t unlearn the savior complex? Most of the time we end up doing more harm than good. We re-victimize victims. We reinforce power imbalances. We manage symptoms rather than develop solutions. We foster a lack of conflict rather than lean into a productive tension. Friends Of Toms, the charitable arm of TOMS Shoes, is one example of misplaced generosity: a desire to save (and to create good PR) trumping real, lasting change. Search “Day Without Dignity” for more information.

I unlearned the savior complex so that I could be part of real, meaningful, sustainable change. It means taking a support role in causes which don’t directly affect me, taking the lead on issues which do, and always working to change myself.

How to unlearn the savior complex

LISTEN TO OTHERS.

Really listen. Listen with an open heart and mind. Listen without being defensive, without needing to be right. Trust their experiences. Listen without speaking.

EDUCATE YOURSELF.

Don’t rely on others to do the heavy lifting for you. Research; read books (non-fiction and fiction); watch movies; attend meetings and rallies; attend musical and cultural events; surf blogs and YouTube. There is a wealth of information out there by the people living and organizing around all sorts of issues. Don’t read about “Africans”; instead, seek out materials by activists in Egypt, by gay people in Uganda, by mothers in Somalia.

Don’t make it about you.

Remember that “issues” you are “learning about” or “thinking through” are lived realities for other people. It’s OK to be quiet and just listen. It’s OK to be uncomfortable. Contemporary American Christianity talks a lot about “serving” people, you are the one serving. Let go of that model. Instead, work in solidarity. Keep the other centered and central. Hand the microphone. Pass along the interview request, speaking gig, or book deal.

Start.

I use social media to supplement my “in real life” unlearning practices. On Google+ and Twitter, I can listen to others and educate myself. I think Google+ is a revolutionary tool for activists. Harness its power to educate yourself. Free invite from me here if you aren’t already on.

Replacing the savior complex with solidarity

As I unlearn the savior complex, I learn to work in solidarity. Before, when I “served,” I came with a pre-existing notion of what I would do, regardless of whether the people I was “serving” wanted or needed what I have to offer. Working in solidarity means listening, educating myself, and taking a supporting role. It means doing things which make me uncomfortable. It means risking being wrong and messing up. It also comes with immense reward. When I work in solidarity, I push myself to grow. I evolve. I see the power and impact of solidarity work. The solutions created are meaningful and lasting. The process is an end to itself.

At first, solidarity is difficult: it requires unlearning an approach we’ve been taught. Then, solidarity becomes easy. I ask myself some basic questions.

1.  Who is most effected?
2.  Who is most invested?
3.  What solutions are those people proposing?
4.  What do they require of me?

And then I simply act upon the answers.

Why unlearning the savior complex will improve your movement

When you replace the savior complex with solidarity work, your movement will become stronger. The savior complex is a false foundation. We are told it is strong and solid, but it is useless and ineffective. Solidarity work is tough and durable, it is proven, and it bears fruit immediately (and more in the future).

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question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What is the 'savior complex' according to the author?

answer: A desire to 'save' the world and those who cannot save (or help) themselves.

answer: The savior complex is the notion that one must save people from a situation or problem, when in fact those people can take care of themselves. This undermines the best solutions coming from the people most effected by the issue. Unlearning the savior complex leads to stronger movements by focusing on solidarity work.

answer: The 'savior complex' refers to the idea that someone, usually the one with more power, must save those who are less powerful. It is based on two assumptions: that those people cannot solve their own problems or that what the powerful individual does is actually helpful. The author argues that when working toward progressive causes, it is better to work in solidarity rather than trying to save others. This improves movements by creating a more solid foundation and by producing better solutions.

answer: A mentality where someone feels like they must save others from a situation.

answer: The commentator wrote that the 'savior complex' is this feeling that they need to save the world and that they have to expend effort in trying to save people from issues by themselves.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why does the author want to unlearn the savior complex?

answer: The author believes that the savior complex disempowers people by assuming that they cannot help themselves. Instead of trying to "save" others, the author believes working in solidarity is more effective and leads to better outcomes overall.

answer: He states that the world can't be saved and the need to save anyone from anything rests on two unproven assumptions: people can't save themselves, and trying to save them is actually helping.

text: We don't know the gender of the author.

refinement: They state that the world can't be saved and the need to save anyone from anything rests on two unproven assumptions: people can't save themselves, and trying to save them is actually helping.

text:
Why unlearn the savior complex?

The notion that we, that I, that you, need to save anyone from anything rests on two unproven assumptions:

1. Those people cannot save themselves
2. What we do is actually helpful

answer: The author states that someone who says one of the cannot help people who cannot speak for themselves should be considered a liar. Furthermore, there are people who have created ways to combat poverty (such as slaves who have freed themselves from slavery) because the author who is a Christian thinks that the poor need to be saved from poverty.

text: "Liar" is a strong word that is not used in the original text. The entire first sentence is confusing-what are "cannot help people"? The entire paragraph is confusing.

refinement: The author states that everyone can communicate their needs and wants. Furthermore, there are people who have created ways to combat poverty (such as slaves who have freed themselves from slavery) because the author who is a Christian thinks that the poor need to be saved from poverty.

text: The last sentence feels really shoehorned in; what the author is saying is that sometimes the savior complex means people are re-victimized. Of course we should help poor people, according to the author, but not at the expense of believing and acting as if the poor cannot help themselves-in the author's opinion, that is oppression.

refinement: The author states that everyone can communicate their needs and wants. They cite the fact that poor people climb out of poverty and that slaves have freed themselves, and use this as evidence that sometimes attempts to save people can be oppressive. The author thinks that we should be asking questions about solidarity instead of saviorship.

answer: The author says it's because it's not needed and harms people.

text: I added why the author thinks this.

refinement: The author says it's because it's not needed and harms people because it ignores their own agency and knowledge of how to overcome obstacles. They have the most intimate understanding of their conditions and are not helpless.

answer: The author wants to replace the savior complex with solidarity work for a number of reasons. Specifically, the savior complex is unrealistic, it creates more harm than good, and it creates barriers to productive, sustainable change. When someone uses the savior complex, their movement will be weaker, which is diametrically opposed to the author's goals. Ultimately, the author wants movements to be stronger, and replacing the savior complex with solidarity work achieves this goal.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How can one unlearn the savior complex according to the author?

answer: The author suggests learning from a supportive place in mind to start. The author suggests listening and researching. The author also suggests taking a supporting role.

text: There's a repeat of "the author suggests" that could be condensed to make the whole answer sound more natural.

refinement: The author suggests learning from a supportive place in mind to start, listening and researching, and taking a supporting role.

answer: The author says the reader should LISTEN TO OTHERS, EDUCATE HIMSELF, and REMEMBER THAT HE CAN TRUST THEIR EXPERIENCES. They should let go of the model that everyone should serve. He says it helps to replace the savior complex with solidarity.

text: We don't know the gender of the author.

refinement: The author says the reader should LISTEN TO OTHERS, EDUCATE HIMSELF, and REMEMBER THAT HE CAN TRUST THEIR EXPERIENCES. They should let go of the model that everyone should serve. They say it helps to replace the savior complex with solidarity.

answer: The author suggests that one way to unlearn the savior complex is to listen to others, educate oneself, and work in solidarity. Whenever you make a decision to work with others, ask questions about who is most effected, who is most invested, and what solutions others are proposing. Use this information while taking a supporting role that respects the agency of those most affected by the issue you are addressing.

answer: The author advises readers to listen to others and learn from their experiences. They should educate themselves and avoid coming into movements with the desire to save anyone. Rather, solidarity work should be undertaken with a supportive role in mind. This approach will improve movements overall.

answer: Listen to others, educating oneself, don't make it about 'You,' and start

text: This is a cut off after the word "start".

refinement: Listen to others, educating oneself, and don't make it about 'you,'.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

According to the author, what can the savior complex be replaced with and why?

answer: Solidarity, because it is the most practical, sustainable method.

text: American Christianity talks a lot about “serving” people, you are the one serving. Let go of that model. Instead, work in solidarity. Keep the other centered and central. Hand the microphone. Pass along the interview request, speaking gig, or book deal.

answer: The savior complex can be replaced with solidarity because it means listening, educating oneself, and taking a supporting role instead of taking the lead. Working in solidarity can be uncomfortable and carries risks, but the rewards are growth and evolution.

text: American Christianity talks a lot about “serving” people, you are the one serving. Let go of that model. Instead, work in solidarity. Keep the other centered and central. Hand the microphone. Pass along the interview request, speaking gig, or book deal.

answer: The savior complex can be replaced with solidarity. The author says working in solidarity will yield better results than the savior complex.

text: American Christianity talks a lot about “serving” people, you are the one serving. Let go of that model. Instead, work in solidarity. Keep the other centered and central. Hand the microphone. Pass along the interview request, speaking gig, or book deal.

answer: The savior complex can be replaced with solidarity work in order to strengthen a movement. The author believes this to be the most effective way of both listening to others and becoming more effective in addressing issues. By listening, people are better able to educate themselves on ways to support and partner with the people affected by the issue at hand. This creates a stronger foundation and lasting solutions.

text: American Christianity talks a lot about “serving” people, you are the one serving. Let go of that model. Instead, work in solidarity. Keep the other centered and central. Hand the microphone. Pass along the interview request, speaking gig, or book deal.

answer: The savior complex can be replaced with solidarity work. The savior complex is ineffective and false while solidarity work is strong and durable. This is because it relies on listening and supporting while the savior complex artificially assumes its own importance. Solidarity work broadens the solutions and creates lasting change.

text: American Christianity talks a lot about “serving” people, you are the one serving. Let go of that model. Instead, work in solidarity. Keep the other centered and central. Hand the microphone. Pass along the interview request, speaking gig, or book deal.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: The writer is stating that they have learn't the value of empathy and solidarity. They learned you can't save the world because it needs saving. They then say that to do something to positively influence what is pressing on you, focus on learning from the people who are effected and figuring out what they need and how to cut out distractions. We need to get rid of the savior complex and replace it with solidarity.

text: This needs an introduction with the word "savior complex".

refinement: According to the writer, humans have a savior complex because we haven't learned the value of empathy and solidarity. They learned you can't save the world because it needs saving. They then say that to do something to positively influence what is pressing on you, focus on learning from the people who are effected and figuring out what they need and how to cut out distractions. We need to get rid of the savior complex and replace it with solidarity.

answer: The author of the blog post says that people need to unlearn the 'savior complex' because the world cannot be saved and the need to save anyone from anything rests on unproven assumptions that people can't save themselves and the help they are getting is actually doing any good. The author says that unlearning the savior complex requires listening to others, educating oneself, never making it about 'you,' and starting the process. The author further states that the savior complex should be replaced with working in solidarity because it means listening, educating oneself, and taking a supporting role. The rewards of solidarity are personal growth and evolution.

answer: The savior complex is harmful and dangerous. If we want to make real, positive change, we need to stop putting ourselves in the role of saviors and instead embrace solidarity work. This means listening to others, educating ourselves, and stepping into a supporting role. This will make movements stronger and more effective.

answer: Unlearning the savior complex means working in solidarity with those directly affected by the issue at hand. This creates meaningful, sustainable solutions. Replacing the savior complex with solidarity strengthens movements.

text: This needs the author's take on why the savior complex is bad.

refinement: The author finds fault with the fact that the savior complex can and often does, in their words, revictimize people. Unlearning the savior complex means working in solidarity with those directly affected by the issue at hand. This creates meaningful, sustainable solutions. Replacing the savior complex with solidarity strengthens movements.

answer: A self-exploration into why people create "savior complexes." This self-rationalization leads to questions on what is necessary to eradicate this behavior or trait from society. The general consensus and advice seems to be that for the societally challenged to grow with enlightenment, empathy. and solidarity are the tools necessary to do so. The author runs through these in extensive detail. The lessons learned from sharing this has had a positive impact on society.

text: This needs a complete first sentence.

refinement: This is a self-exploration into why people create "savior complexes." This self-rationalization leads to questions on what is necessary to eradicate this behavior or trait from society. The general consensus and advice seems to be that for the societally challenged to grow with enlightenment, empathy. and solidarity are the tools necessary to do so. The author runs through these in extensive detail. The lessons learned from sharing this has had a positive impact on society.


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(Part 1) By the mid-22nd century, time travel had become a mundane and everyday reality. When the phenomenon had first been introduced to the mass consciousness due to a theft of documents by a government employee, massive steps had been proposed to limit the possibly detrimental effects of what would likely become a hugely popular social pastime. An international committee, after much deliberation and the investment of a great deal of working hours and taxpayers money, eventually decided on three rules of time travel:

1) Do nothing to affect the social development of the people of the time
2) Do nothing to deliberately invoke a change to events in the future, particularly for perceived personal gain
3) Behave with no emotion as emotion breeds emotion in others and so can affect events

As soon as the committee announced these rules to an eagerly listening world, researchers at TEID (Time Effect Investigation Department, a team set up to monitor the behaviour of it’s citizens by researching past documents) began to find that the rules weren’t perhaps as effective as they had hoped. Time travelling citizens trying to behave without emotion were being viewed with high suspicion in Nazi Germany, the witch hunting eras of the late 17th century and the vampire fearing villages of mediaeval Slavic Europe. All of these unfortunate souls were being summarily tortured, executed, and were failing to return home from their trips.
They also found it impossible to not affect social development as travellers ended up in the bars and public houses of times throughout history, invariably became drunk and opinionated, and ended up either instigating or, in some exceptional cases, getting a little carried away and leading entire revolutionary movements.

Lastly, it was quickly realised that it was impossible to not have an affect on future events as a whole anyway as the person’s mere arrival and subsequent existence in the past occupied space and therefore had instigated a change by just moving the air particles, anything over and above that would cause a more obvious chain reaction (such as stopping traffic at a road crossing or feeding an animal) and so it was deemed impossible to enforce any of the laws they had worked so tirelessly to create.
At this point a press conference was set up to announce this failure, one journalist pointed out the impossibility of enforcing such laws due to the nature of time travel anyway and, after a lot of silence and shoe gazing, the scientists and international representatives decided to disband and research something that could be controlled instead, with no doubt at all, such as wormhole leaping.

Despite the best efforts of authorities to restrict the sale of time travel machines, a huge black market was predicted, then materialised, and then once one particuarly entrepreneurial individual, Jiff Beaner, had gone three hundred years into the future and bought not only all the books on the history of time travel so as to learn all the industrial lessons of his competitiors to come, but also returning in a much bigger time machine with (after a few trips) parts enough for a time machine manufacturing unit from the future as well, mass production kicked into play and the time machine was now in 63% of all households by the end of the first manufacturing year alone. Naturally, Jiff was soon outdone by another who carried out exactly the same plan as Jiff had and outdid him overnight. Not only did the competitor have all of Jiff’s ideas for the next three hundred years but he also had a manufacturing unit three hundred years newer. Then someone outdid that man, and so it went on ad taedium.

Time Travel became a standard leisure activity, people beamed from here to there, and the world continued (as far as they knew) the same as it always had.

Then, not long afterwards, a researcher at TEID came across something that would change the public’s perspective of time travel completely. It was a man called Gerald Keys, he had travelled to 18th century colonial America, and there for no reason yet apparent, he had killed sombeody.

title: Trillers - A story about Time Travel

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about the impossibility of enforcing the three rules of time travel?

answer: The impossibility of the international committee's enforcement of the three rules became apparent. As soon as the rules were made, researchers at TEID began to find that the rules were not effective. In regard to the first rule on not affecting social development (don't do anything to affect the social development of the people of the time), time travellers were watched with high suspicion because their behaviours were found to be deemed suspicious. With the obligation to also be non-emotional (do nothing to deliberately invoke a change to events in the future, particularly for perceived personal gain), the travellers are already becoming unpleasant. With the third rule stating to behave with no emotion (behave with no emotion), the travellers began to show their personality - they get drunk and opinionated and made the bar scene their stomping ground. Travellers were found to instigate and lead entire revolutionary movements.

text: This should be do nothing to change events in the future

refinement:
The impossibility of the international committee's enforcement of the three rules became apparent. As soon as the rules were made, researchers at TEID began to find that the rules were not effective. In regard to the first rule on not affecting social development (don't do anything to affect the social development of the people of the time), time travellers were watched with high suspicion because their behaviours were found to be deemed suspicious.
With the obligation to not change future events(do nothing to deliberately invoke a change to events in the future, particularly for perceived personal gain), the travellers are already finding it impossible.

With the third rule stating to behave with no emotion (behave with no emotion), the travellers began to show their personality - they get drunk and opinionated and made the bar scene their stomping ground. Travellers were found to instigate and lead entire revolutionary movements.

text: Remove the rules in parentheses because this is hard to read and does not elucidate the rules

refinement:
The impossibility of the international committee's enforcement of the three rules became apparent. As soon as the rules were made, researchers at TEID began to find that the rules were not effective. In regard to the first rule on not affecting social development, time travellers were watched with high suspicion because their behaviours were found to be deemed suspicious.
With the obligation to also be non-emotional, the travellers are already becoming unpleasant.

With the third rule stating to behave with no emotion, the travellers began to show their personality - they get drunk and opinionated and made the bar scene their stomping ground. Travellers were found to instigate and lead entire revolutionary movements.

text: The summary needs to be cleaned up and have a clear demarcation of senses

refinement:
As soon as the researchers at TEID (Time Effect Investigation Department) announced the rules of time travel, they began to find that the rules weren't as effective as they had hoped. Travelers who showed no emotions were being treated with suspicion, tortured, persecuted, and executed. It was impossible not to affect social development because travelers needed up in bars and public houses. They were adding to the economy, getting drunk and opinionated about issues, and in some rare cases, leading revolutions. Lastly, it was impossible not to have an effect on future events as a whole as a person's mere arrival and existence in the past occupied space and therefore, instigated change.With the obligation to also be non-emotional, the travellers are already becoming unpleasant.

With the third rule stating to behave with no emotion, the travellers began to show their personality - they get drunk and opinionated and made the bar scene their stomping ground. Travellers were found to instigate and lead entire revolutionary movements.

answer: The story says that the three rules of time travel prove to be impossible to enforce because they are impossible to follow due to the nature of time travel. It says that it is impossible to not affect social development and to not have an affect on future events while engaging in time travel.

text: This does not describe anything

refinement: It says that it is impossible to not affect social development and to not have an affect on future events while engaging in time travel.

text: The summary should state what the three rules of time travel are and enumerate their issues

refinement: As soon as the researchers at TEID (Time Effect Investigation Department) announced the rules of time travel, they began to find that the rules weren't as effective as they had hoped. Travelers who showed no emotions were being treated with suspicion, tortured, persecuted, and executed. It was impossible not to affect social development because travelers needed up in bars and public houses. They were adding to the economy, getting drunk and opinionated about issues, and in some rare cases, leading revolutions. Lastly, it was impossible not to have an effect on future events as a whole as a person's mere arrival and existence in the past occupied space and therefore, instigated change.

answer: The story says that it is impossible to enforce the three rules of time travel because it is impossible to avoid influencing the development of social events in the past, despite trying to act without emotion. Travelers inevitably end up sticking their noses where they're not supposed to and this disrupts the natural course of events, making it impossible to maintain control.

text: The summary should state what are the laws of time travel explicitly in a tripartite structure

refinement: As soon as the researchers at TEID (Time Effect Investigation Department) announced the rules of time travel, they began to find that the rules weren't as effective as they had hoped. Travelers who showed no emotions were being treated with suspicion, tortured, persecuted, and executed. It was impossible not to affect social development because travelers needed up in bars and public houses. They were adding to the economy, getting drunk and opinionated about issues, and in some rare cases, leading revolutions. Lastly, it was impossible not to have an effect on future events as a whole as a person's mere arrival and existence in the past occupied space and therefore, instigated change.

answer: As soon as the researchers at TEID (Time Effect Investigation Department) announced the rules of time travel, they began to find that the rules weren't as effective as they had hoped. Travelers who showed no emotions were being treated with suspicion, tortured, persecuted, and executed. It was impossible not to affect social development because travelers needed up in bars and public houses. They were adding to the economy, getting drunk and opinionated about issues, and in some rare cases, leading revolutions. Lastly, it was impossible not to have an effect on future events as a whole as a person's mere arrival and existence in the past occupied space and therefore, instigated change.

answer: When the international committee revealed their searchin mechanism, the author implied that it was did not work. The international committee accompanied the details with a press conference. The international committee asked the audience to suggest how they could get around these issues, and a journalist reiterated, there's no way round it. Ultimately, the international committee scrapped their ideas and presented an alternative, like wormhole leaping.

text: The international committee's new decision on research has nothing to do with the answer to this question.

refinement: As soon as the researchers at TEID (Time Effect Investigation Department) announced the rules of time travel, they began to find that the rules weren't as effective as they had hoped. Travelers who showed no emotions were being treated with suspicion, tortured, persecuted, and executed. It was impossible not to affect social development because travelers needed up in bars and public houses. They were adding to the economy, getting drunk and opinionated about issues, and in some rare cases, leading revolutions. Lastly, it was impossible not to have an effect on future events as a whole as a person's mere arrival and existence in the past occupied space and therefore, instigated change.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about time travel in the mid-22nd century?

answer: Time travel had become a mundane and everyday reality. It all started when a government employee stole confidential documents about time travel. When the phenomenon had been first introduced to the mass consciousness, steps had been proposed to limit the detrimental effects before it could become a popular pastime. An international committee on time travel was formed to set rules and enforce them, but it was deemed a failure because the rules were impossible to enforce. Despite the best efforts of authorities to restrict the sale of time travel machines, a huge black market materialized and thrived.

answer: Time travel has become a commonplace and everyday reality by the mid-22nd century. However, rules have been put in place to try to limit negative effects of its use; however, these rules have proven largely ineffective. Gerald Keys travels to colonial America and kills someone, showing that even with these rules in place there can still be drastic consequences.

text: This line is not relevant to the question

refinement: Time travel has become a commonplace and everyday reality by the mid-22nd century. However, rules have been put in place to try to limit negative effects of its use; however, these rules have proven largely ineffective.

text: Explain how time travel became commonplace, and go into more detail about the regulations

refinement: Time travel had become a mundane and everyday reality. It all started when a government employee stole confidential documents about time travel. When the phenomenon had been first introduced to the mass consciousness, steps had been proposed to limit the detrimental effects before it could become a popular pastime. An international committee on time travel was formed to set rules and enforce them, but it was deemed a failure because the rules were impossible to enforce. Despite the best efforts of authorities to restrict the sale of time travel machines, a huge black market materialized and thrived.

answer: A story says that when time travel warp-drive was invented and introduced to humans, people started using it for selfish reasons. They started making money, changing history and taking away precious things of the past. A committee was formed to set rules to govern people's use of the time machine, but unless it could be enforced, the use of the time machine would only be banned in the law books.

text: Explain more about how time travel was introduced

refinement: Time travel had become a mundane and everyday reality. It all started when a government employee stole confidential documents about time travel. When the phenomenon had been first introduced to the mass consciousness, steps had been proposed to limit the detrimental effects before it could become a popular pastime. An international committee on time travel was formed to set rules and enforce them, but it was deemed a failure because the rules were impossible to enforce. Despite the best efforts of authorities to restrict the sale of time travel machines, a huge black market materialized and thrived.

answer: Time travel became a common everyday occurrence in the mid-22nd century, with citizens being easily able to travel without restrictions. However, despite the international committee's valiant efforts to control time travel and enforce rules, it was impossible for them to prevent citizens from affecting social development, and from inadvertently engaging in future events. Eventually, a researcher finds out that someone travelling in time has killed someone, making the public aware that this activity carries risks. Time travel is portrayed as dangerous and unpredictable.

text: Explain more about how time travel was introduced

refinement: Time travel became a common everyday occurrence in the mid-22nd century, with citizens being easily able to travel without restrictions. It was introduced to mass consciousness due to the theft of documents by a government employee. However, despite the international committee's valiant efforts to control time travel and enforce rules, it was impossible for them to prevent citizens from affecting social development, and from inadvertently engaging in future events. Eventually, a researcher finds out that someone travelling in time has killed someone, making the public aware that this activity carries risks. Time travel is portrayed as dangerous and unpredictable.

answer: The time travel technology was so advanced that it became a mundane and everyday reality by mid-22nd century. The first time travel machine was invented by Jiff Beaner and was bought with a time machine manufacturing unit from the future. Then, masses of time travel machines were sold in the market. Travelers could be anywhere, do anything. Then, one recognized a man killed some humans in 18th century colonial America, and that decision changed the public's perspective about the life after travel.

text: This sentence is not relevant to the summary

refinement: The time travel technology was so advanced that it became a mundane and everyday reality by mid-22nd century. The first time travel machine was invented by Jiff Beaner and was bought with a time machine manufacturing unit from the future. Then, masses of time travel machines were sold in the market. Travelers could be anywhere, do anything.

text: Jiff Beaner is not relevant to the summary.

refinement: The time travel technology was so advanced that it became a mundane and everyday reality by mid-22nd century.  Travelers could be anywhere, do anything.

text: Provide more detail about how time travel technology emerged

refinement: Time travel had become a mundane and everyday reality. It all started when a government employee stole confidential documents about time travel. When the phenomenon had been first introduced to the mass consciousness, steps had been proposed to limit the detrimental effects before it could become a popular pastime. An international committee on time travel was formed to set rules and enforce them, but it was deemed a failure because the rules were impossible to enforce. Despite the best efforts of authorities to restrict the sale of time travel machines, a huge black market materialized and thrived.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about Jiff Beaner?

answer: The story describes Jiff Beaner as an entrepreneurial individual who got ahead of competitors in the time machine market by learning from and imitating their success. The story also says that Jiff was responsible for someone committing a murder in 18th century colonial America. Therefore, it can be inferred that Jiff is likely motivated by capitalism and profit-making.

text: The story does not say this

refinement: The story describes Jiff Beaner as an entrepreneurial individual who got ahead of competitors in the time machine market by learning from and imitating their success. Therefore, it can be inferred that Jiff is likely motivated by capitalism and profit-making.

text: This response does not discuss how Jim made a profit, what his business model was, or his travels to the future. All of it should be rewritten

refinement: Jiff Beaner was a pioneer of the time machine black market. He went three hundred years into the future and bought all the history books on time travel. He learned all the industrial lessons of his future competitors. He came back with a bigger time machine and parts for a time machine manufacturing unit from the future. He mass-produced time machines, and by the end of his first manufacturing year, had sold units to 63% of all households. Naturally, someone caught on and Jiff's idea was copied overnight, starting a cycle of moving far into the future to get information and technology to affect the present.

answer: Jiff Beaner is a man who sells time travel machines. According to the story, Jiff was able to make a large profit out of his trade because, within a short period of time, there were many others who also tried to garner profits off of selling time machines. At the same time, however, the use of such a machine renders all the established laws about time travel worthless. Selling actual time travel machines was eventually prohibited but it seems that nothing could really be done about laws about time travel because the machines could be created around those laws.

text: This does not go into detail about how he obtained the machines in the future, or about his competitors

refinement: Jiff Beaner is a man who sells time travel machines. He was a pioneer of the time machine black market. He went three hundred years into the future and bought all the history books on time travel. He learned all the industrial lessons of his future competitors. He came back with a bigger time machine and parts for a time machine manufacturing unit from the future. He mass-produced time machines, and by the end of his first manufacturing year, had sold units to 63% of all households. Naturally, someone caught on and Jiff's idea was copied overnight, starting a cycle of moving far into the future to get information and technology to affect the present.

answer: The story says that Jiff Beaner is a businessman who was the first in mass producing time machines. It also says that he went into the past and became successful at creating a business. However, Gerald Keys travels to colonial America and kills somebody, at which point it reveals that Jiff Beaner is generally careless.

text: This is not relevant, accurate, or coherent!

refinement: The story says that Jiff Beaner is a businessman who was the first in mass producing time machines. It also says that he went into the past and became successful at creating a business.

text: He did not go into the past, he went into the future

refinement: Jiff Beaner was a pioneer of the time machine black market. He went three hundred years into the future and bought all the history books on time travel. He learned all the industrial lessons of his future competitors. He came back with a bigger time machine and parts for a time machine manufacturing unit from the future. He mass-produced time machines, and by the end of his first manufacturing year, had sold units to 63% of all households. Naturally, someone caught on and Jiff's idea was copied overnight, starting a cycle of moving far into the future to get information and technology to affect the present.

answer: Jiff Beaner is an entrepreneurial individual who for no reason yet apparent killed a colonial American. He was the first entrepreneur to buy all the books on the history of time travel so as to learn from his competitor's history and then went three hundred years into the future to buy all the books on the history there so he could replicate it on his own. He also employed a time machine manufacturing company from the future to mass-produce time machines.

text: He did not kill a colonial american.

refinement: Jiff Beaner is an entrepreneurial individual. He was the first entrepreneur to buy all the books on the history of time travel so as to learn from his competitor's history and then went three hundred years into the future to buy all the books on the history there so he could replicate it on his own. He also employed a time machine manufacturing company from the future to mass-produce time machines.

text: Describe how Jim was copied

refinement: Jiff Beaner was a pioneer of the time machine black market. He went three hundred years into the future and bought all the history books on time travel. He learned all the industrial lessons of his future competitors. He came back with a bigger time machine and parts for a time machine manufacturing unit from the future. He mass-produced time machines, and by the end of his first manufacturing year, had sold units to 63% of all households. Naturally, someone caught on and Jiff's idea was copied overnight, starting a cycle of moving far into the future to get information and technology to affect the present.

answer: Jiff Beaner was a pioneer of the time machine black market. He went three hundred years into the future and bought all the history books on time travel. He learned all the industrial lessons of his future competitors. He came back with a bigger time machine and parts for a time machine manufacturing unit from the future. He mass-produced time machines, and by the end of his first manufacturing year, had sold units to 63% of all households. Naturally, someone caught on and Jiff was undone overnight, starting a cycle of moving far into the future to get information and technology to affect the present.

text: Be more specific about what "undone" means

refinement: Jiff Beaner was a pioneer of the time machine black market. He went three hundred years into the future and bought all the history books on time travel. He learned all the industrial lessons of his future competitors. He came back with a bigger time machine and parts for a time machine manufacturing unit from the future. He mass-produced time machines, and by the end of his first manufacturing year, had sold units to 63% of all households. Naturally, someone caught on and Jiff's idea was copied overnight, starting a cycle of moving far into the future to get information and technology to affect the present.


text:
                                                                                Stay alive; that was the goal. Stay alive long enough for History to remember you… What if I can’t make it that long? What if this rifle I carry becomes too much for me? I shoved those questions into the back of my mind, vigorously, as if slamming a drawer shut in hurriedness. My mother told me to get out, get out of the house and don’t look back, that she and my sister would endure the raids on the homes of our village. I don’t know why they couldn’t keep with me, why they couldn’t follow me through the valleys and mountains I’ve traversed in these past few weeks… Maybe they lost hope? Maybe they didn’t want to wage war with life any longer…
But I am alone now, just a boy and his gun on the run for his life. I had one magazine and a bullet in the chamber, enough to get me through to a new home… or another soldier, you never know out here. But they were after me, The Tyrants, my mother would call them; an organization bent on taking over this entire country. We were just another check in the tallies, our small mining town on the side of a mountain, far off from anywhere. They still wanted us anyway, just for land… Just for land.
                 I lay prone in a bush covered in thorns under a downed tree, the needles piercing through my clothing as I watched the enemy militia sit around a small fire, ranting on about how their Commanding Officer doesn’t give enough food in their daily rations. I could hear my stomach growl in anger at them as I longed for their steaming cups of coffee with a buttered biscuit. My mouth watered from the aroma they gave… But maybe that was just my senses going into over drive. My eyes drooped with weariness, and sank lower and lower with every breath of frozen winter air I took. I thought they were weighed down with lead, and I couldn’t hold them open anymore…
The sky seemed to hold a dark blue hue, fading to light as it touched the horizon. I looked upon the floor, vertical lines seeming to span on forever. I saw two figures in close, one seemed familiar to me. In her hand she held a page, smeared in illegible writings that only her eye could read. Her head hung low, a tear dripping from the corner of her eye, a creek of one drop.  Before her was another woman, but of strange stature, a bouquet of flowers a-many color, but with the grey of steel mixed in with the fibers, showing her tense visage. “Why did he have to die mother?” The first woman asked the other, a tremble in her voice, easily comparable to a warble in the voice of an anxious public speaker.
                “Every person has a role to fill in life, he has done his, my child, and God needs him no longer.” I tried to rush to the both of them, as fast as my weary legs would bear, but my soles seemed to fill with lead, and my feet were encased in stone. The stone seemed to multiply particle by particle around me, panic rising in my blood like bubbles in a boiling pot. By the time it covered my face, I was absorbed in a dark unlike no other, it was a compressed abyss that seemed to never end, like a nightmare that you can’t escape. My sight was restored, oddly, but it seemed dark, every color muffled to its lightest degree. I saw the women still standing there, the first woman now with a rush of tears pouring down her pink pastel cheeks. The woman with her flowery head comforted her to the best extent she could, trying to put on a dance for the crying girl. I opened my mouth and tried to scream, but I seemed heavier, bulkier than normal, weighed down by my own body. I couldn’t utter a sound, it was as if my vocal cords had frozen, maybe they turned to stone themselves. A bright light figure appeared before my frame, slender and tall like an un-bruised birch.
         “Shh…” He muttered before waving his slim fingers before my eyes, making my shift to black again…
I shuttered awake, the queer sense that the dream left behind made my bones rattle under my skin. The soldiers now slept around their dying fire, snoring so loud, it could over power a truck horn. I sighed quietly, relief flowing through my body a wave at a time. “I wonder what that could have meant?” I questioned myself as I pulled my tattered body out of the shrub little by little. The snow crunched as I wiggled out from under the downed tree, to make my get away from these pigs-of-soldiers. But before I could manage to pull myself up and make a break, and hand pushed my back into the ice glazed snow, the water from the melted bits coursing in through the tears in my dress. It rolled my over to face a completely bright man, slim and tall, just like the one in the dream.
“Shh…” He whispered, before his blade stuck in my chest, and my heart rate fell to nothing…

title: [Slim] Inspired by Salvador Dali's Femme a tete de Roses

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about why The Tyrants were after the narrator's life?

answer: The Tyrants wanted the narrator's life because they were after the entire facility considering their small mining town is part of the country. They wanted the narrator dead just to take the land.

text: The Tyrants are amassing land and want the small mining town. This is expressed awkwardly in the answer.

refinement: The Tyrants wanted the narrator's life because they were after the small mining he lived in. They wanted the narrator dead just to take the land.

answer: The Ayatollahs of this group are bent on taking over the country. They want more land for their leader, who is one of the most powerful men in the world

text: There's no group named "Ayatollahs" in the text. There's no mention of a leader as well.

text: The answer is empty.

refinement: They are after everyone's life in the village because they are amassing land.

answer: No answer

text: The question can be answered.

refinement: They are after everyone's life in the village because they are amassing land.

answer: The Ayatollahs of this group are bent on taking over the country. They conquered the narrator's small village, the narrator's mother warned him to flee and survive long enough for history to remember him. He steals from the enemy soldiers' camps during the night and gives what he can back, but they want more and they want him.

answer: The Tyrants stole land from other countries to create their empire. The narrator's family had already been evacuated by his mother before the battle.

text: There's no mention of other countries or The Tyrants forming an empire. The family didn't evacuate as well, just the narrator.

text: The answer is empty.

refinement: They are after everyone's life in the village because they are amassing land.

answer: The Tyrants, an organization bent on taking over the country, wanted the narrator's life and the lives of most people in the town. Story does not specify the reason. The narrator's family had already been evacuated by his mother before the battle.

text: The narrator's mother told him to run away; there was no evacuation.

refinement: The Tyrants, an organization bent on taking over the country, wanted the narrator's life and the lives of most people in the town. Story does not specify the reason.

text: The Tyrants want the land, which is stated explicitly in the story.

refinement: The Tyrants, an organization bent on taking over the country, wanted the narrator's life and the lives of most people in the town. They want the land.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about why the narrator had to part with his family and why were The Tyrants bent on taking over their country?

answer: The narrator and his family were running away from home because The Tyrants were bad for another reason. The narrator's mother said that she and the narrator's sister would be okay in the village while the narrator ran away to survive. During their escape, the narrator thought that they had just wanted land so they consigned people to death by raiding a village, destroying livelihoods and homes. The narrator's family wanted to survive, even if they thought they would be okay without him.

text: "The narrator's family wanted to survive, even if they thought they would be okay without him." This sentence is nonsensical.

refinement: The narrator and his family were running away from home because The Tyrants were bad for another reason. The narrator's mother said that she and the narrator's sister would be okay in the village while the narrator ran away to survive. During their escape, the narrator thought that they had just wanted land so they consigned people to death by raiding a village, destroying livelihoods and homes.

text: The first sentence doesn't add anything to the answer. Its accuracy is also questionable.

refinement: The narrator's mother said that she and the narrator's sister would be okay in the village while the narrator ran away to survive. During their escape, the narrator thought that they had just wanted land so they consigned people to death by raiding a village, destroying livelihoods and homes.

text: Since the narrator fled alone, the answer should reflect that.

refinement: The narrator's mother said that she and the narrator's sister would be okay in the village while the narrator ran away to survive. During his escape, the narrator thought that they had just wanted land so they consigned people to death by raiding a village, destroying livelihoods and homes.

answer: The narrator and his family were running away from home because The Tyrants were bad for another reason. During their escape, the narrator thought that they had just wanted land so they consigned people to death by raiding a village, destroying livelihoods and homes. The narrator's family wanted to survive, even if they thought they would be okay without him.

text: "The narrator's family wanted to survive, even if they thought they would be okay without him." This sentence is nonsensical.

refinement: The narrator and his family were running away from home because The Tyrants were bad for another reason. During their escape, the narrator thought that they had just wanted land so they consigned people to death by raiding a village, destroying livelihoods and homes.

text: The first sentence doesn't add anything to the answer. Its accuracy is also questionable.

refinement: During their escape, the narrator thought that they had just wanted land so they consigned people to death by raiding a village, destroying livelihoods and homes.

text: The answer omits the reason why the narrator is separated from his family.

refinement: The narrator's mother said that she and the narrator's sister would be okay in the village while the narrator ran away to survive. During their escape, the narrator thought that they had just wanted land so they consigned people to death by raiding a village, destroying livelihoods and homes.

text: Since the narrator fled alone, the answer should reflect that.

refinement: The narrator's mother said that she and the narrator's sister would be okay in the village while the narrator ran away to survive. During his escape, the narrator thought that they had just wanted land so they consigned people to death by raiding a village, destroying livelihoods and homes.

answer: No answer

text: The question can be answered.

refinement: The narrator's mother said that she and the narrator's sister would be okay in the village while the narrator ran away to survive. During his escape, the narrator thought that they had just wanted land so they consigned people to death by raiding a village, destroying livelihoods and homes.

answer: The story does not specify why The Tyrants wanted to take over their country. However, the narrator's family are hiding in terror as The Tyrants spread all over their country, taking over every place that they see fit. They have a small mining town in the side of a mountain, and although it is out of the way, The Tyrants still want it. They'll simply kill the town dwellers and drive them out of their homes in order to have more land.

text: The story doesn't cover what the narrator's family is doing since his mother sent him away weeks ago.

refinement: The story does not specify why The Tyrants wanted to take over their country. They have a small mining town in the side of a mountain, and although it is out of the way, The Tyrants still want it. They'll simply kill the town dwellers and drive them out of their homes in order to have more land.

text: The answer omits why the narrator is separated from his family.

refinement: The story does not specify why The Tyrants wanted to take over their country. They have a small mining town in the side of a mountain, and although it is out of the way, The Tyrants still want it. They'll simply kill the town dwellers and drive them out of their homes in order to have more land. The narrator is traveling alone because his mother sent him away, saying she and his sister will endure the raids.

text: The wrong preposition used in front of "mountain"

refinement: The story does not specify why The Tyrants wanted to take over their country. They have a small mining town on the side of a mountain, and although it is out of the way, The Tyrants still want it. They'll simply kill the town dwellers and drive them out of their homes in order to have more land. The narrator is traveling alone because his mother sent him away, saying she and his sister will endure the raids.

answer: The Tyrants are an evil organization bent on taking over the entire country. The narrator's home town is a small mining town in the side of a mountain far from anywhere, The Tyrants still want it. The narrator and his family are hiding in terror from The Tyrants. His mother gave him a parting but of advice to run far for a new home, so he sets off alone with a single bullet and a magazine.

text: We don't know what the narrator's family is doing since he's separated from them weeks ago.

refinement: The Tyrants are an evil organization bent on taking over the entire country. The narrator's home town is a small mining town in the side of a mountain far from anywhere, The Tyrants still want it. His mother gave him a parting but of advice to run far for a new home, so he sets off alone with a single bullet and a magazine.

text: The last sentence is phrased awkwardly.

refinement: The Tyrants are an evil organization bent on taking over the entire country. The narrator's home town is a small mining town in the side of a mountain far from anywhere, The Tyrants still want it. His mother told him to leave and find a new home, so he sets off alone with a single bullet and a magazine.

text: The wrong preposition is used before "mountain" and "hometown" is misspelled.

refinement: The Tyrants are an evil organization bent on taking over the entire country. The narrator's hometown is a small mining town on the side of a mountain far from anywhere, The Tyrants still want it. His mother told him to leave and find a new home, so he sets off alone with a single bullet and a magazine.

answer: The Tyrants, an organization bent on taking over this entire country, were pushing their small mining town on the side of a mountain into joining them in their uprising.

text: There is no uprising mentioned, and the reason for the Tyrants to take over the narrator's country isn't specifically mentioned.

text: The answer is empty.

refinement: The narrator's mother said that she and the narrator's sister would be okay in the village while the narrator ran away to survive. During his escape, the narrator thought that they had just wanted land so they consigned people to death by raiding a village, destroying livelihoods and homes.


text:
Passion Fruit

	It was the finest orange I had seen in months. It was right in front of me in a tall, blue trash bin. I looked around in all directions to make sure no one else had seen it, and was thrilled to find that my eyes and my eyes only gazed at the luscious fruit before me. The afternoon sun danced across the porous surface, highlighting its beautiful features. The prize was mine.
	I hoisted my bag over my shoulder, not caring about the various objects that spilled over, and shuffled my tired feet towards the trash bin. I put on my best angry face in case any passerby’s in the park decided they wanted it for themselves. Just a couple feet from the trash bin, a young boy got too close. I lashed out at him, showing my rotting teeth as angrily as I knew how. The boy screamed and nearly fell as he made his escape on his bike. The incident made me cackle, and I moved ever closer to the orange.
	Within reach, I stretched my hand outward, admiring my filthy fingernails as I did so. I curled my bony fingers around the orange and quickly plucked it from the bin. I held it to my chest tightly and looked around again. Mine! All mine! I made my way eagerly towards a nearby bench. A young couple on the bench saw me approaching and moved away in a hurry. It made me truly appreciate my power.
	My smile only got bigger as I sat and admired my prize. All mine! I tossed my bag aside, my attention never leaving the orange. I rubbed my hands all around it, enjoying the textures, its perfections and imperfections. I gave it a light squeeze, testing its durability. It was just how I liked it, not too soft or too firm. It was cool in my palm and my dry, putrid mouth began to water.
	Overwhelmed with anticipation, I pressed my thumb down hard onto the peel. With a soft pop, I broke through the surface and shook with joy as juice flowed from the opening. I quivered as my thumb made contact with the soft, wet innards of the orange. I considered leaving my thumb in a while longer, but decided against it. I knew my satisfaction could not be achieved by touch alone. My mouth ached with desire as I inspected the orange one last time. With my thumb still plunged deep inside, I tightened my grip and started to peel my prize. Mine! All mine!
	My hand was soaked with lovely juices as I removed the last bit of skin. Finally the orange was stripped clean and I stared at it intensely. At last I could indulge; I could leave this troubled world behind for a moment and occupy myself with this pure, beautiful creation.
	I lifted the orange to my cracked lips and took a hungry bite. Fresh juices sprayed from my mouth as I slowly chewed my first chunk. I savored every moment until the last bite. I held the sloppy piece before me, wishing, hoping, praying that somehow it would be whole again. I closed my eyes hoping to find a new orange in my hand when I opened them, but the same piece remained. I became overwhelmed with sadness and was surprised when a tear rolled down my cheek.
	I crushed the last bite of orange in my hand, sending pulp and juice all around me, and I threw the pathetic nibble to the ground. I let out a decrepit scream, startling those who walked by. The orange betrayed me! The bastard made me cry! My enormous desire for the fruit had now turned to boiling anger. Revenge! I only wanted revenge. I was thinking about exactly what I wanted revenge for when I saw her.
	She was walking along a concrete path in the park. Her hair flowed in the breeze like a blonde sea. She was wearing a red tank top, revealing an impressive bust. My eyes lingered there a moment. It was the finest bosom I had seen in months. Her white shirt, littered with red roses, moved gracefully as she walked, and I enjoyed the pitter-patter of her white flip-flops. She held a tan purse with her right arm, and carried a grocery bag with her left.
	I stood up, almost in awe at the site before me. I looked around in all directions to make sure no one else had seen her. The park was crowded and no one paid much attention to anyone else. I was thrilled. I picked up my tattered and dirty bag and started along the concrete path. The same path my new prize was already on. I was about forty feet behind her and struggled to keep up. My tired feet protested, but I moved on. Mine! All mine!
	We walked for some time, eventually leaving the park. I was thirty feet behind now, getting closer and closer. She continued confidently, never stopping or looking behind her. She looked to be in her twenties, but difficult to tell from this distance. It didn’t matter; she would be mine soon either way.
	Still gaining on her, I followed her into a residential area with houses all around. I was careful to make sure no one else saw my prize. I didn’t want anyone to try taking her from me, not at all. Finally she turned into a driveway and I was filled with excitement. I nearly had her in my grasp, I was so close.
	By the time I reached the driveway, I could hear her opening the front door. I hurried in to reach the door, but my bag proved to be a burden. By the time I was at the entrance, she was already inside. I cursed and felt my prize slipping away. I stared at the door knob for a couple of minutes. I saw my hideous reflection in the gleaming brass and smiled, pleased with myself. I reached for the door knob and was thrilled to discover that the door was unlocked. Mine! All mine!
	I slowly pushed the door open and peeked my head inside. The front room was bright and cheery, tidy and well organized. I could hear my prize somewhere inside; she was humming a familiar tune. I moved all the way inside and carefully shut the door behind me. The air inside was cool and pleasant, a welcome change from the hot summer temperature. I eased my way closer to where I heard her sweet voice. I made my way down a hallway, taking a moment to admire some family photos on the way. My prize was a beautiful one to be sure. I almost couldn’t believe that I would soon have my hands on her.
	I turned the corner leading into the kitchen and came face to face with my prize. I gave my biggest smile and she froze in place. She was quite a bit shorter than myself and had a wonderful shape. I raised my arm and reached out at her, ready to claim my prize. Just then she let out a wild scream, startling me. She was to be mine, my prize, yet she screamed and screamed. She looked at me with disgust and turned to run.
	“Mine! All mine!” I shouted. I swung my bag as hard as my gangly arms would allow and struck her in the back. The impact caused her to fall face first onto the tile floor. I heard a crack and a grunt and watched her try to get up. She was obviously shaken, and she was definitely hurt. She turned over on her back, her eyes were flooded with tears, her nose soaked in blood.
	“Help! Please… Please help! Please don’t hurt me!” Her screams and cries were music to my ears. She sobbed hysterically as I closed in on her. The prize was mine at last. I crouched down beside her and studied her wonderful features, highlighted by the dancing sunlight coming from outside. I reached hungrily for her luscious breasts, eager to test their durability. She let out another scream, and I smiled. “Mine… All Mine…”
	Just then, I felt a burning pain radiating from my chest, accompanied by a thunderous bang. I felt suddenly weak and my prize blurred before me. A single tear rolled down my left cheek. And then there was darkness.

	I awoke some time later in a hospital bed. I frantically looked about for my prize, but she was gone. I was immediately blinded by rage and confusion. Outside the hospital door I saw one police officer talking to another.
	“Hell of a shot, Rob. Probably saved that girls life,” he said. And then I saw it. Across the hall was a young boy in a hospital bed. At his side, on a small table, sat a single red apple. It was beautiful. It was the finest apple I had seen in months.

			…Mine…All Mine….

The End

title: Passion Fruit

question: Who is the protagonist?

answer: The protagonist of the story is the person who seeks to claim his or her prize, regardless of the consequences.

answer: The protagonist of the story is clearly the mentally disturbed individual who enters the house and attacks the young woman.

text: It is omitted that his 'prize' keeps changing.

refinement: The protagonist of the story is clearly the mentally disturbed individual who enters the house and attacks the young woman. He keeps obsessing over things he finds desirable.

text: "The impact caused her to fall face first onto the tile floor." This is evidence that the man attacked the woman.

answer: The protagonist is a homeless person with mental disabilities, obsessing about whatever he sees as desirable.

question: Why does the protagonist chase and assault the blonde girl?

answer: Because he wants to molest her, and because he's too impatient to wait until the old woman dies and can inherit everything.

text: The story does not mention any old woman nor does it directly state that the man wants to 'molest' the woman.

refinement: The story does not clearly state why the man chases and assaults the blonde woman. But after he eats his orange, he feels betrayed by it and seeks some sort of revenge.

answer: He becomes enraged because the orange he finds in the trash can is finite. He cries upon finishing it and considers this a betrayal from the orange. In a desperate attempt to exact some sort of revenge, he fixates on the blonde girl.

answer: He has an intense desire for things to be his.

text: It is omitted that he seeks revenge after he eats his orange.

refinement: He has an intense desire for things to be his. After he eats his orange, he seeks some sort of a revenge and hence chases the woman.

question: What happens to the protagonist at the end?

answer: He is shot by the house owner the protagonist was trying to woo.

text: It is wrongly stated that the house owner shoots him.

answer: A police officer shoots him before he can go further than assaulting the blonde girl. He wakes up at a hospital. While angry at first, he fixates on an apple and forgets about the blonde girl.

answer: He gets shot by a police officer after acting violently towards a female.

text: It is omitted that he ends up in a hospital.

refinement: He gets shot by a police officer after acting violently towards a female. He wakes up in the hospital and fixates his eyes on an apple, forgetting the blonde woman.

question: What are the central themes of the story?

answer: They seem to be insanity and fixation.

answer: Man sets out to get an orange from the trash and end up assaulting a woman, in his paranoia believing she was trying to take his pleasures from him. He fulfills his sexual fantasies by assaulting the woman, badly injuring her.

text: There is no evidence that he believed that the woman was trying to take his pleasures from him.

refinement: Man sets out to get an orange from the trash and end up assaulting a woman, it seems as though in his paranoia believing she was trying to take his pleasures from him. He fulfills his sexual fantasies by assaulting the woman, badly injuring her.

answer: The story appears to be a commentary on the lengths the human condition will go, especially when it is not in pursuit of any real tangible object. It also seems to play on themes of power, possession, jealousy, desperation, selfishness, and of course, sex.

question: Write a ~6 sentence summary.

answer: A homeless man finds an orange and savors it, eating it slowly. As the orange's last bite remains, he cries because it's finished. Considering this a betrayal by the orange, he decides to exact revenge in some way. He notices a blonde girl and fixates on her. After following her home, he assaults her but a police officer shoots him before he can go further. He wakes up in a hospital and fixates on an apple, forgetting the girl.

text: It isn't clearly stated that the police officer shoots him. Although, it may be implied.

refinement: A homeless man finds an orange and savors it, eating it slowly. As the orange's last bite remains, he cries because it's finished. Considering this a betrayal by the orange, he decides to exact revenge in some way. He notices a blonde girl and fixates on her. After following her home, he assaults her but as it seems a police officer shoots him before he can go further. He wakes up in a hospital and fixates on an apple, forgetting the girl.

text: The fact that the man is looking for food in a trash can and carries a bag with various object, shows that he is a homeless man.

answer: The story is about a man with severe mental health issues who finds a ripe, luscious orange in a trash can. He extricates himself from his surroundings and goes to a bench to sit. Treasuring it without any taste, he tries to use it in various ways, like trying to choke himself with it or lamely attempting to strike a bystander. He's getting a lot of revenge on people that day before he decides to get some food. Upon being interrupted by a young woman offering to buy his bag, the man comes to in a hospital with Rob, the arresting officer, telling the young woman he was shooting to save her life.

text: It isn't directly stated that the man suffers from severe mental health issues. Although, it can be implied from the story.

refinement: The story is about a man who seems to have severe mental health issues. who finds a ripe, luscious orange in a trash can. He extricates himself from his surroundings and goes to a bench to sit. Treasuring it without any taste, he tries to use it in various ways, like trying to choke himself with it or lamely attempting to strike a bystander. He's getting a lot of revenge on people that day before he decides to get some food. Upon being interrupted by a young woman offering to buy his bag, the man comes to in a hospital with Rob, the arresting officer, telling the young woman he was shooting to save her life.

text: It is wrongly stated that the man tries to use the orange in various ways.

refinement: The story is about a man who seems to have severe mental health issues. He finds a ripe, luscious orange in a trash can and extricates himself from his surroundings and goes to a bench to sit. Treasuring it and after admiring its beauty, he eats it. Ultimately he laments that the juicy fruit was over and it had 'betrayed' him. His eyes then fall on a blonde woman, he follows her and assaults her at her home. He wakes up in the hospital and his eyes fall on an apple and he whispers, "All mine". He's getting a lot of revenge on people that day before he decides to get some food. Upon being interrupted by a young woman offering to buy his bag, the man comes to in a hospital with Rob, the arresting officer, telling the young woman he was shooting to save her life.

text: "He's getting a lot of revenge on people that day before he decides to get some food. Upon being interrupted by a young woman offering to buy his bag, the man comes to in a hospital with Rob, the arresting officer, telling the young woman he was shooting to save her life." This information is false and hence should be omitted.

refinement: The story is about a man who seems to have severe mental health issues. He finds a ripe, luscious orange in a trash can and extricates himself from his surroundings and goes to a bench to sit. Treasuring it and after admiring its beauty, he eats it. Ultimately he laments that the juicy fruit was over and it had 'betrayed' him. His eyes then fall on a blonde woman, he follows her and assaults her at her home. He wakes up in the hospital and his eyes fall on an apple and he whispers, "All mine".

answer: The narrator, a scrawny middle-aged man, finds an orange at the dumpster in the park and hoists his bag to make sure it's all his. He clutches the orange to his chest tightly. The park is filled with many people, and the narrator is glad that no one is paying attention to him except for a boy. The boy gets too close and the narrator lashes out at him because he wants this orange all to himself. He admires his prize, but he can't just have it. He peels the orange and takes a big bite. After a while, he has the orange, and sees a very beautiful girl. He schemes how he can run around this beautiful woman and finally grab her.

text: It is omitted that the man assaults the woman in her house.

refinement: The narrator, a scrawny middle-aged man, finds an orange at the dumpster in the park and hoists his bag to make sure it's all his. He clutches the orange to his chest tightly. The park is filled with many people, and the narrator is glad that no one is paying attention to him except for a boy. The boy gets too close and the narrator lashes out at him because he wants this orange all to himself. He admires his prize, but he can't just have it. He peels the orange and takes a big bite. After a while, he has the orange, and sees a very beautiful girl. He schemes how he can run around this beautiful woman and finally grab her. The man assaults the woman in her house and it seems the police comes and shoots him.

text: "showing my rotting teeth as angrily as I knew how." is evidence that the man lashes out at the boy.

answer: A woman finds and wrestles herself an luscious orange inside a trash bin. Just as she's about to peel and bite the fruit, she finds herself driven by rage, hatred, and a single idea. She runs after the woman with the kind of body she's had her eyes on. She runs and tackles the woman, and upon seeing her from a closer vantage point tears to her breast, her luscious breasts. Just as she is about to take her prize, the woman screams, and in her blind rage to silence the woman, the dabbles her with a knife.

text: It is wrongly stated that the narrator is a woman.

refinement: A man finds and wrestles himslf an luscious orange inside a trash bin. Just as he's about to peel and bite the fruit, he finds himself driven by rage, hatred, and a single idea. He runs after the woman with the kind of body he's had his eyes on. He runs and tackles the woman, and upon seeing her from a closer vantage point tears to her breast, her luscious breasts. Just as he is about to take his prize, the woman screams, and in her blind rage to silence the woman, the dabbles her with a knife.

text: It is falsely stated that the woman "dabbles her with a knife"

refinement: A man finds and wrestles himself an luscious orange inside a trash bin. Just as he's about to peel and bite the fruit, he finds himself driven by rage, hatred, and a single idea. He runs after the woman with the kind of body he's had his eyes on. He runs and tackles the woman, and upon seeing her from a closer vantage point tears to her breast, her luscious breasts. Just as he is about to take his prize, the woman screams, and the narrator feels a sharp pain in his chest and his eyesight blurs.

text: "himself an luscious orange" is grammatically incorrect.

refinement: A man finds and wrestles himself a luscious orange inside a trash bin. Just as he's about to peel and bite the fruit, he finds himself driven by rage, hatred, and a single idea. He runs after the woman with the kind of body he's had his eyes on. He runs and tackles the woman, and upon seeing her from a closer vantage point tears to her breast, her luscious breasts. Just as he is about to take his prize, the woman screams, and the narrator feels a sharp pain in his chest and his eyesight blurs.

answer: A homeless beggar sees an orange sitting trash at the bottom of a blue trash can and watches for any passers-by. He tries to deter a passing boy by holding up his rotting teeth, but he laughs and manages to also scare away a few young couples. Only his prize remains. In a rage, he pulls out his filthy, bony fingers and attempts to pluck out the orange to peek into its soft and sweet innards. The orange is now his, he will relish every moment. He bites into the orange and is not sure how to feel about it being gone now. Someone saunters in from the bathroom and threatens the beggar. She aims her gun at the beggar's head and shoots his heart, killing him.

text: There is no evidence that the orange was at the bottom of the trash can.

refinement: A homeless beggar sees an orange sitting trash on a blue trash can and watches for any passers-by. He tries to deter a passing boy by holding up his rotting teeth, but he laughs and manages to also scare away a few young couples. Only his prize remains. In a rage, he pulls out his filthy, bony fingers and attempts to pluck out the orange to peek into its soft and sweet innards. The orange is now his, he will relish every moment. He bites into the orange and is not sure how to feel about it being gone now. Someone saunters in from the bathroom and threatens the beggar. She aims her gun at the beggar's head and shoots his heart, killing him.

text: It is wrongly stated that the boy laughs and the man scares away a few young couples too.

refinement: A homeless beggar sees an orange sitting trash on a blue trash can and watches for any passers-by. He tries to deter a passing boy by holding up his rotting teeth, he escapes. Only his prize remains. In a rage, he pulls out his filthy, bony fingers and attempts to pluck out the orange to peek into its soft and sweet innards. The orange is now his, he will relish every moment. He bites into the orange and is not sure how to feel about it being gone now. Someone saunters in from the bathroom and threatens the beggar. She aims her gun at the beggar's head and shoots his heart, killing him.

text: "Someone saunters in from the bathroom and threatens the beggar. She aims her gun at the beggar's head and shoots his heart, killing him." This is an additional false detail provided in the response, which can be omitted.

refinement: A homeless beggar sees an orange sitting trash on a blue trash can and watches for any passers-by. He tries to deter a passing boy by holding up his rotting teeth, he escapes. Only his prize remains. In a rage, he pulls out his filthy, bony fingers and attempts to pluck out the orange to peek into its soft and sweet innards. The orange is now his, he will relish every moment. He bites into the orange and is not sure how to feel about it being gone now. He shifts his sight to a beautiful woman, he follows her home and ultimately assaults her. The beggar wakes up in the hospital and starts eyeing an apple.

answer: A man with the appearence of a vagrant picks up a so called unbeatable orange trash in front of him. He's about to pick up the orange when a boy gets too close to it. The man reacts with disgust and lash out at the boy. As the man calmly picks up the orange, he is reminded of his prize and goes after her. He finds her in the street and oddly enough, she looks constrained as well and he also plans on claiming her. He goes after her but by the time he reaches her, she's almost in her house and about to shut her door.

text: "unbeatable orange trash in front of him" is incorrect. The orange was in the trash can.

refinement: A man with the appearence of a vagrant picks up a so called unbeatable orange in the trash in front of him. He's about to pick up the orange when a boy gets too close to it. The man reacts with disgust and lash out at the boy. As the man calmly picks up the orange, he is reminded of his prize and goes after her. He finds her in the street and oddly enough, she looks constrained as well and he also plans on claiming her. He goes after her but by the time he reaches her, she's almost in her house and about to shut her door.

text: It is falsely stated that the man is reminded of the woman (his prize).

refinement: A man with the appearence of a vagrant picks up a so called unbeatable orange in the trash in front of him. He's about to pick up the orange when a boy gets too close to it. The man reacts with disgust and lash out at the boy. As the man calmly picks up the orange and eats it. He then sees a beautiful woman and goes after her. He finds her in the street and oddly enough, she looks constrained as well and he also plans on claiming her. He goes after her but by the time he reaches her, she's almost in her house and about to shut her door.

text: It is omitted that he assaults her and seems to be caught by the police.

refinement: A man with the appearence of a vagrant picks up a so called unbeatable orange in the trash in front of him. He's about to pick up the orange when a boy gets too close to it. The man reacts with disgust and lash out at the boy. As the man calmly picks up the orange and eats it. He then sees a beautiful woman and goes after her. He finds her in the street and oddly enough, she looks constrained as well and he also plans on claiming her. He goes after her but by the time he reaches her, she's almost in her house and about to shut her door. He eventually gets inside, assaults the woman and seems to be caught by the police.


text:
	Here I sit, the late september breeze holding back my hair while
 the ancient tree bark scratches my back as I bite into my last apple of
 the day. Through the tired branches full of leaves ready to hibernate, I
 can see the sun is getting ready for its daily rest. It’s time to go
home, time to leave this sanctuary where I can clear my mind and
hum and whistle for only the mosquitos and bugs to hear. No one to
watch, no one to listen. Sometimes it’s nice to just explore the woods,
 to just get away from life for a few hours and walk under low branches
 where a cold wind can whisper its secrets into your ear. I’ve been in
 these woods since I was little, my family used to live across the
 street; we used to come here as a family and explore this land
 together. This one time it was just my dad, two brothers and me, we
 were walking around a field of tall weeds on a warm summer evening,
 the air was fresh and the sun was gentle. We felt the earth moving
 under us and looked down, only to see hundreds of worm-sized
 snakes crawling over and around our now needle wide feet. It didn’t
 take long to realize we just so happened to intrude on the birth of the
 forest’s snake family. That day is one that I will remember for my life,
 unlike the snakes who would not remember that event even a single
 day after their journey around the moving trees.
	Growing older, I appreciated the nature brought by this forest
 more; I began to understand how everything in it is a family. The
 trees hold the ground which holds the trees. The animals and bugs
 help the roses and other painted petals explore the world and are
 given their grandparents’ fruits in exchange. Everything works
 together, and everything is happy. In the forest, everything is one;
 being in the forest, you are part of this family. Once I realized that, I
 finally could open my mind and see myself as more than just myself. I
 would spend hours and days exploring the rooted ground, using fallen
 uncles as bridges over rivers of mud to find a peaceful spot to sit and
 breath. After enough exploration, I never had much trouble finding a
 natural throne for me to sit and breath my thoughts into the wind. I
 learned how to give thoughts to leaves and pain to earthed limbs. The
 sun would look at me as I look into its ocean and understand its
 concern for me exploring its child.
	After many lives came and went in this forest, I found another
 person that I could open up to, a person that I knew I could bring into
 my sanctuary to see what I have seen and feel what I have felt. I
 found a friend that would walk these bridges and sit on the retired
 soldiers that rest in the forest. The forest became my home away
 from home. It became a place to open my mind and to smile without
 bounds. It became a place to bring my other half and tell them how I
 feel about them and about the world. Then one day, the forest
 became my knee as I asked my other half for permission to kiss them
 without regret and to hold them until the sun interrupts. The forest
 grew with us, we grew with the forest. We would come back to it
 occasionally; however, we realized that time was changing, time falls
 faster and life begins to get in the way of exploration. In order to
 remind this sanctuary that it is forever in our hearts, we left our love
 scar in the oldest and tallest root that was holding everyone’s hand in
 the forest.
	One day, we will return to this home to show we have not
 forgotten it. We will come to it and be one with the world, be one with
 each other. Be one with everything until we realize that by being one
 with everything, you are everything. Realizing that everything is
 connected in a way. Whispering, “I love you” into the wind and telling
 it your secrets so that one day another soul can venture into the
 forest and be chilled by the breeze that whispers secrets into their ear
 too.

title: The Forest

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What state of mind is the writer trying to convey to their readers?

answer: Peaceful and tranquil. They show appreciation for the forest and their family, that it become a place for them to connect with one another.

answer: Peaceful and tranquil.

text: The response could do with more details. The word "peaceful" is grammatically incorrect.

refinement: The narrator is trying to convey a sense of peace and tranquil in nature.

answer: The writer is trying to convey a sense of peace and harmony with nature.

answer: The writer is trying to convey a sense of calm and peace.

text: The response fails to place itself into a relevant context.

refinement: The writer is trying to convey a sense of calm and peace within nature.

answer: They are trying to seduce their readers into the rabbit hole of their thoughts.

text: The passage conveys a different sentiment from that of the response.

refinement: The narrator expresses the calm and peace they felt being in the presence of their family and nature.