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I am trying to be a writer, I would like opinions.  Feel free to be as harsh or as flattering as you want, in my eyes its all constructive.  It might be a bit hard to figure out, so I guess also comment on what you think its about.

	The lights were flickering on and off.  He came into view three or four times.  Large bursts of light erupting from a pitch black abyss.  In the room, there were no sounds, no breaths, no heart beats.  When the lights were on the black abyss turned into a room, and the room was all white with blisteringly powerful light spraying off everywhere.  When the lights turned on, maybe a half a second, maybe three quarters, I was able to make out a figure.  Large, dark and angry.  Eyes completely yellow, staring me down.  My eyes reflected in his, the reflection so bright, how could I possibly look away.  I shoved my hands against my temples and squeezed, the man falling in and out of my sight.  The light turned off, a wave of black falling over me, like a midnight black blanket being wrapped around my head on a bright day.  I fell over slightly and felt nauseous.  I tripped on my own feet and my head banged against the floor, or the wall, I’m not really sure which.  At times like these I always ran to the door, kicking and screaming to let me out, to let me breathe, but I always heard the same words every time I banged the door, “anesthesia.”  I would loose track of the door at that point.  First it was on the left, then it was on the right.  Rotating around me like the orbit of a moon sped up.
	They would always turn the lights on at the worst moment, right when I would close my eyes, right when I was going to get some rest finally.  I was a child waiting for a Christmas that never came.  Sometimes, during these fits of light, I would catch the faint glimmer of a shadow over me.  The shadow of a demon like being with the horns of a devil and the knife of a butcher.  Picking and pulling at my well being, the chords of thought being plucked right from under me.  I was never able to move at these moments, never able to reach out my hand and grasp the ephemeral hand over me.  The lights started to flicker again, in and out.  If I was a bucket of sand, they would be emptying me gradually, and each grain of sand that would fall out would just disappear as it left the bucket, with each flicker of the light this would continue to happen.  The bang and the light coming and going from those in front of me who were never actually in front of me.  A worthless fight.
	How long has it been?  A week?  A month?  I’d bang on the door when I could find it.  I’d yell my name just to yell it, just to gain something from a lost experience, right up until that was lost too.  And when I’d yell, I’d cry, because I was yelling my life, my upbringing, my experiences.  After each yell, it would go, after each cry I’d forget.  And on that final day, when there was nothing left to yell, I’d wake up.
	I would wake up lying down, people in white standing over me with light shining down and red tools lying next to me.  Everything is in front of me, but I cant grasp it.  Like a fisherman trying to grab the reflection of a fish going by with his bare hands.  Except now, I am all empty.

title: This is my story (read and criticize)

question: Is the narrator locked somewhere?

answer: The narrator is locked inside by the person holding her or him captive.

answer: That isn't really answered explicitly, but it seems like they are undergoing some type of surgery.

text: It seems like they are not being held willingly, though.

refinement: That isn't really answered explicitly, but it seems like they are undergoing some type of surgery.

text: "...but I always heard the same words every time I banged the door, 'anesthesia'.

answer: Yes, the narrator is locked in a room. The lights of the room are mostly switched off so he cannot figure what the room looks like.

question: What did the demon look like?

text: It had devil horns.

answer: The figure standing over the horrified boy takes the form of an angry demon who appears a butcher with horns or a devil with enormous yellow eyes.

answer: The demon had yellow eyes, he was large and had horns. He held a butcher's knife.

question: What did it feel like being locked inside the room?

answer: The narrator felt completely lost. He had lost track of time. The room was completely dark and he felt nauseous. Irritated by his situation, he would kick the door and scream to let him out.

text: There is too much information given, and that makes it feel like it was copied and pasted.

refinement: The narrator felt completely lost because he had lost track of time and the room was completely dark and he felt nauseous.

answer: It felt isolating. The narrator got scared when the lights would be on and he could see a man, but the man would only be surrounding by a pitch black. He'd scream and bang on the door, but the words he heard was anesthesia.

text: It has too many details.

refinement: The narrator felt completely lost because he had lost track of time and the room was completely dark and he felt nauseous.

answer: The narrator felt her mind slowly draining away during these times.

text: This could benefit from the word "isolating".

refinement: The narrator felt isolated,and like her mind slowly draining away during these times.

question: Is the narrator dreaming?

answer:
What does the dream seem to be about?

It seems as though the narrator is dreaming about being trapped inside a room that is intermittently lit, presumably to conduct some sort of medical or scientific experiment on the narrator. In the dream, the narrator is unable to move when the lights come on, and the shadowy figure of a demon-like being is always lurking near, although it is never fully revealed.

text: This seems to be a verbose and roundabout way to answer the question.

refinement: It seems as though the narrator is dreaming about being trapped inside a room that is intermittently lit, presumably to conduct some sort of medical or scientific experiment on the narrator. In the dream, the narrator is unable to move when the lights come on, and the shadowy figure of a demon-like being is always lurking near, although it is never fully revealed.

answer: This information is not mentioned.

answer: Or is the narrator succumbing to a gas-induced hallucination?

text: This is a question, not an answer.

refinement: The narrator could be dreaming, or they could be succumbing to a gas-induced hallucination.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: The narrator is claustrophobic, and always goes to the door when the lights are going on and off. The door is moving around him, and when he goes by the last door, terrorists shine light directly on him till that last door goes. His claustrophobia worsens. He wakes up lying on the floor with staff and people in white shining light on him.

text: This is not about the narrator's being claustrophobic, so I don't know that you should lead with that.

refinement: The narrator is stuck in a room, feeling claustrophobic, and always goes to the door when the lights are going on and off. The door is moving around him, and when he goes by the last door, terrorists shine light directly on him till that last door goes. His claustrophobia worsens. He wakes up lying on the floor with staff and people in white shining light on him.

text: The first sentence is also misleading because the narrator sees the demon-like figure going to the door, and is not going to the door himself.

refinement: The narrator is stuck in a room, feeling claustrophobic. There is a demon-like figure that always goes to the door when the lights are going on and off. The door is moving around him, and when he goes by the last door, terrorists shine light directly on him till that last door goes. His claustrophobia worsens. He wakes up lying on the floor with staff and people in white shining light on him.

answer: A writer (the narrator) is describing how he is trying to be a writer. The lights are flickering and it feels like they are showing him something, a man with yellow eyes who comes into view and then disappears. The lights come on and turn off at strange times, and after endless lights, the narrator wakes up in a white room with lights and tools walking towards him.

text: You don't need the first sentence, as the author's note is more of a preamble and not a part of the actual story.

refinement: The lights are flickering and it feels like they are showing him something, a man with yellow eyes who comes into view and then disappears. The lights come on and turn off at strange times, and after endless lights, the narrator wakes up in a white room with lights and tools walking towards him.

text: This should have more to indicate the narrator is in a clinical hospital or lab-like setting.

refinement: The narrator is in a white room that is occasionally brightly-lit. A man with yellow eyes repeatedly comes into view in the white room and then disappears. The lights come on and turn off at strange times, and after endless lights, the narrator wakes up in a white room with lights and tools walking towards him.

text: There should be something to indicate this has been going on for an unknown amount of time to emphasize that the narrator is disoriented.

refinement: The narrator is in a white room that is occasionally brightly-lit. A man with yellow eyes repeatedly comes into view in the white room and then disappears. The lights come on and turn off at strange times, and after endless lights, the narrator wakes up in a white room with lights and tools walking towards him. The narrator has no idea how long this goes on.

answer: The protagonist wakes up in a trance-like state. Everything around him or her is an illusion bordering on perception, and something beyond those illusory perceptions is happening. Lights keep flickering on and off and the protagonist is trying to figure out where the room begins and the illusion ends. The doctor needs to continue this treatment, or the patient will die.

text: There's nothing in the original text to corroborate the final sentence.

refinement: The protagonist wakes up in a trance-like state. Everything around him or her is an illusion bordering on perception, and something beyond those illusory perceptions is happening. Lights keep flickering on and off and the protagonist is trying to figure out where the room begins and the illusion ends.

text: I would add that the narrator has no idea how long this goes on.

refinement: The protagonist wakes up in a trance-like state. Everything around him or her is an illusion bordering on perception, and something beyond those illusory perceptions is happening. Lights keep flickering on and off and the protagonist is trying to figure out where the room begins and the illusion ends. The narrator has no concept of time, no idea how long this goes on.

text: I think the term "protagonist" should be "narrator" because protagonist is loaded with the idea that the audience should want to root for this person and we have no evidence that we should be anything but neutral.

refinement: The narrator wakes up in a trance-like state. Everything around him or her is an illusion bordering on perception, and something beyond those illusory perceptions is happening. Lights keep flickering on and off and the protagonist is trying to figure out where the room begins and the illusion ends. The narrator has no concept of time, no idea how long this goes on.

text: I think instead of using binary gender, you can just use "them".

refinement: The narrator wakes up in a trance-like state. Everything around them is an illusion bordering on perception, and something beyond those illusory perceptions is happening. Lights keep flickering on and off and the protagonist is trying to figure out where the room begins and the illusion ends. The narrator has no concept of time, no idea how long this goes on.

answer: The narrator is probably held captive, strapped to something with straps that are fastened to the metal poles of a bed. Unable to move from the straps, the lights are flickering on and off, assaulting their fragile mind. They recite, when blind (always blinded), reality becomes distorted and cracks into false reality. Everything vanishes with the closing of their eyes and the lights flash the worst, and the flashes of lights are the only thing that brings them to consciousness.

answer:
The narrator was locked inside a dark room. The lights would turn on for hardly a second and he would witness a large, dark, and angry demon staring right back at him.

He would scream and kick the door to let him out but they wouldn't. He had forgotten how long had he been in there.

text: This should be in the present tense

refinement:
The narrator is locked inside a dark room. The lights turn on for hardly a second and he witnesses a large, dark, and angry demon staring right back at him.

He screams and kicks the door to let him out but they wouldn't. He has forgotten how long had he been in there.

answer: The narrator is trapped in a white room, the lights flicker on and off at intervals, to allow a man, dark and angry, to ocassionally be seen in a pitch black void. Occasionally, a Demon like figure is also seen in the lights, picking and pulling at the narrator's thoughts. The narrator cries, and on the last day of the experiment, woken by white robed men with lights shining down, they cry finally having found " enlightenment".

text: Grammar- it should be "demon-like".

refinement: The narrator is trapped in a white room, the lights flicker on and off at intervals, to allow a man, dark and angry, to ocassionally be seen in a pitch black void. Occasionally, a demon-like figure is also seen in the lights, picking and pulling at the narrator's thoughts. The narrator cries, and on the last day of the experiment, woken by white robed men with lights shining down, they cry finally having found " enlightenment".

text: There is no indication or mention that the narrator has found enlightenment or that it's the end of anything in this passage.

refinement: The narrator is trapped in a white room, the lights flicker on and off at intervals, to allow a man, dark and angry, to ocassionally be seen in a pitch black void. Occasionally, a demon-like figure is also seen in the lights, picking and pulling at the narrator's thoughts.

text: There should be some indication that the narrator doesn't know how long any of this goes on.

refinement: The narrator is trapped in a white room, the lights flicker on and off at intervals, to allow a man, dark and angry, to ocassionally be seen in a pitch black void. Occasionally, a demon-like figure is also seen in the lights, picking and pulling at the narrator's thoughts. They do not know how long this goes on.


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Today, I’m going to let you know about an amazing way to connect to all the blogs & magazines you adore. It’s called bHome, and iPhone | iPad users as well as Android users can download the FREE APP and be a part of our fabulous inspiring Home And Garden Community. You’ll be able to find FrenchGardenHouse and over 40 of your favorite blogs and magazines in one place, ON YOUR PHONE!

If you love Instagram, YOU’LL LOVE THIS APP. There are big photos of your favorite blogs in the home and garden community, and YOU WILL BE ABLE TO CLICK DIRECTLY OVER TO THEIR BLOG, INSTAGRAM ACCOUNT, SHOP AND EVEN CHECK OUT THEIR FAVORITE PLAYLISTS! HOW FABULOUS IS THAT?! It’s the most user friendly, easiest way to be inspired, and to connect!

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I am so honored to be included with this group of inspiring bloggers and publications. The best part is that not only will you be able to read the blogposts, see all the creative inspiration, get recipes and more, _you will also be able to interact with all the bHome bloggers from your cell phone. iPad users: bHome runs great on your iPad as an iPhone app._

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I know we all lead busy lives, so this is just about perfect when you are stuck waiting in line to buy dinner ingredients at the market, or waiting at the car wash, or sitting in your car waiting to pick up children, or any other time when you have nothing to do. {I know, those times are few and far in-between!}

To celebrate, FrenchGardenHouse is having a FABULOUS GIVEAWAY! One lucky FrenchGardenHouse reader who downloads the bHome app on their smart phone and follows me on bHome will win a $200.00 GIFT CERTIFICATE to FrenchGardenHouse.  Winner will be announced on 10-12-2015. {Autumn is the perfect time to buy something for your home, or treat yourself to one of our gorgeous pieces of jewelry.} The picture below shows just a small amount of the beautiful pieces you can choose from should you win!

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Here’s how you can enter the GIVEAWAY and find FGH at bHome.

1. Download the FREE app at the app store on your iPhone or Android. You can also  go to bHome and download and join for FREE.

2. Once you have joined bHome, browse “recents” and FrenchGardenHouse should be on the top.

3.TAP the FrenchGardenHouse star then read my message – TAP the link & you are entered – easy as that, 2 TAPS & you are entered to win! How easy is that?

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bHome is the BEST PLACE on your smart phone. You can visit over 40 great Home and Garden bloggers and magazines, view their Blogs and their Pinterest boards, and pin right from them to your Pinterest boards. You will be able to view all of their Instagram, Facebook, Google + and Twitter accounts and interact with everyone there too. bHome is stunning, with so much gorgeous inspiration! It’s easy, and FREE for you to join. I HOPE THAT YOU WILL JOIN ALL OF US AND BE PART OF OUR HIVE.

Please join, and enter to win our $200.00 GIFT CERTIFICATE, I know you will love the community there, and will get so much inspiration. I’M LOOKING FORWARD TO SEEING YOU AT BHOME. Please let others know about bHome, and pin this to your Pinterest board and share on your FaceBook page. Thank you!

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question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the paid version of the bHome App?

answer: No answer

answer: There is no mention of the paid version of the bHome App.

answer: No answer

answer: It seems the paid version of the bHome app may be important for some people who do not have smart phones,  as the presenter talks about using the iPad as an iPhone app, and how the app works on smart phones and tablets like iPads. Most of the discourse about the app has to do with posting to social media.

text: The article does not mention the paid version.

answer: No answer

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the bHome App?

answer: The bHome App is a free app for smart phones or tablets: iPhone or iPad, or any Android phone. With the app, users can view the blogs and magazines they adore on their phone, get recipes and inspirations, and they can even interact with the bHome bloggers.

answer: The bHome App connects to all the blogs & magazines that the user adores. It is FREE for downloading. bHome is the perfect place for many activities like . . . sitting in your car waiting to pick up children, or any other time when you have nothing to do. The app features various features such as the ability to view all of a readers accounts and to interact with them on many platforms, easy onboarding and interaction with all bHome users.

answer: The bHome App is a free app for smart phones or tablets: iPhone or iPad, or any Android phone. With the app, users can view the blogs and magazines they adore on their phone.

answer: The bHome App is an amazing way to connect to all the blogs and magazines one adores. It's a FREE APP that users can download on their smart phone and interact with. The app contains big photos of one's favorite blogs and magazines users will be able to click directly over to their blogs, Instagram accounts, and so on.

answer: The bHome App connect to all the blogs & magazines that the user adores. It is FREE for downloading. bHome is the perfect place for many activities like . . . sitting in your car waiting to pick up children, or any other time when you have nothing to do. The app features various features such as the ability to view all of a readers accounts and to interact with them on many platforms, easy onboarding and interaction with all bHome users.

answer: The bHome App is an amazing way to connect to all the blogs and magazines one adores. It's a FREE APP that users can download on their smart phone and interact with. The app contains big photos of one's favorite blogs and magazines users will be able to click directly over to their blogs, Instagram accounts, and so on. Users will also be able to go to a specific blogger's page to view their blogs, DIY projects, notebooks, as well as favorites' playlist. Users won't feel lonely while they wait anywhere and everywhere because they'll be able to book, chat, and interact with other members of bHome.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the other cool features of the bHome App?

answer: The bHome Blogging and Magazine community has so much to offer iPhone and Android users. There are a dozen features that make it the best. It has a special home slideshow, which is a collection of apps showcasing each person's preferred home decor. A great tool for bloggers and magazines has turned out to be a great tool for all. Since the iPhone sports a retina display for its photos, you'll want bHome for your iPhone. It's a fabulous app that lets you read and view with ease in the app. Other features make it the best.

text: 'There are a dozen features that make it the best. It has a special home slideshow, which is a collection of apps showcasing each person's preferred home decor. A great tool for bloggers and magazines has turned out to be a great tool for all. Since the iPhone sports a retina display for its photos, you'll want bHome for your iPhone. ' is not stated.

refinement: The bHome Blogging and Magazine community has so much to offer iPhone and Android users. It's a fabulous app that lets you read and view with ease in the app. Other features make it the best.

text: It is omitted that you can visit over 40 great Home and Garden bloggers and magazines, view their Blogs and their Pinterest boards and pin right from them to your Pinterest boards. You will be able to view all of their Instagram, Facebook, Google +, and Twitter accounts and interact with everyone there too.

refinement: The bHome Blogging and Magazine community has so much to offer iPhone and Android users. It's a fabulous app that lets you read and view with ease in the app. Other features make it the best. You can visit over 40 great Home and Garden bloggers and magazines, view their Blogs and their Pinterest boards and pin right from them to your Pinterest boards. You will be able to view all of their Instagram, Facebook, Google +, and Twitter accounts and interact with everyone there too.

answer: Users can find their favorite blogs and magazines. There are big pictures of the blogs. Users can click over to the blogs, their Youtube accounts, their IG accounts, Pinterest, Twitter, and more! The emails are summarized excerpts of the posts but clicking its links will open the entire post. This is perfect for the user while multitasking.

text: 'The emails are summarized excerpts of the posts but clicking its links will open the entire post. This is perfect for the user while multitasking.' is not stated.

refinement: Users can find their favorite blogs and magazines. There are big pictures of the blogs. Users can click over to the blogs, their Youtube accounts, their IG accounts, Pinterest, Twitter, and more!

answer: For the user to get instant notifications when the bloggers post new content. Users can find their favorite blogs and magazines. There are big pictures of the blogs. Users can click over to the blogs, their Youtube accounts, their IG accounts, Pinterest, Twitter, and more! Users can also choose to receive notifications of new posts. The emails are summarized excerpts of the posts, but clicking its link will open the entire post. This is perfect for the user while multitasking.

text: 'Users can also choose to receive notifications of new posts. The emails are summarized excerpts of the posts, but clicking its link will open the entire post. This is perfect for the user while multitasking.' is not stated.

refinement: For the user to get instant notifications when the bloggers post new content. Users can find their favorite blogs and magazines. There are big pictures of the blogs. Users can click over to the blogs, their Youtube accounts, their IG accounts, Pinterest, Twitter, and more!

answer: Since bHome runs great on your iPad as an iPhone app, one of the greatest features of bHome is that even when you are away from the computer, you will be able to interact with bloggers from your cell phone when you can use the app on your iPhone or iPad. This also comes with options for users to check out their Instagram, Facebook, Twitter, and other websites as well. bHome is also soothing and easy to use, allowing you to access everything you need while still enjoying the beauty surrounding you.

answer: The bHome Blogging and Magazine community has so much to offer iPhone and Android users. There are a dozen features that make it the best. It has a special home slideshow. A great tool for bloggers and magazines has turned out to be a great tool for all. Since the iPhone sports a retina display for its photos, you'll want bHome for your iPhone. It's a fabulous app that lets you read and view with ease. Other features make it the best.

text: 'It has a special home slideshow. A great tool for bloggers and magazines has turned out to be a great tool for all. Since the iPhone sports a retina display for its photos, you'll want bHome for your iPhone. ' is not stated

refinement: The bHome Blogging and Magazine community has so much to offer iPhone and Android users. There are a dozen features that make it the best. It's a fabulous app that lets you read and view with ease. Other features make it the best.

text: It is omitted that you can visit over 40 great Home and Garden bloggers and magazines, view their Blogs and their Pinterest boards and pin right from them to your Pinterest boards. You will be able to view all of their Instagram, Facebook, Google +, and Twitter accounts and interact with everyone there too. bHome is stunning, with so much gorgeous inspiration!

refinement: The bHome Blogging and Magazine community has so much to offer iPhone and Android users. There are a dozen features that make it the best. It's a fabulous app that lets you read and view with ease. Other features make it the best. You can visit over 40 great Home and Garden bloggers and magazines, view their Blogs and their Pinterest boards and pin right from them to your Pinterest boards. You will be able to view all of their Instagram, Facebook, Google +, and Twitter accounts and interact with everyone there too. bHome is stunning, with so much gorgeous inspiration!

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the FrenchGardenHouse giveaway?

answer: The bHome app is one way to enter to win. The winner will be chosen on October 12th 2015.

text: It is omitted that FrenchGardenHouse is offering a gift certificate for $200 to one lucky reader who downloads the BHome app on their smartphone and follows FrenchGardenHouse on bHome.

refinement: FrenchGardenHouse is offering a gift certificate for $200 to one lucky reader who downloads the BHome app on their smartphone and follows FrenchGardenHouse on bHome. The bHome app is one way to enter to win. The winner will be chosen on October 12th 2015.

text: a comma after '12th' is missing

refinement: FrenchGardenHouse is offering a gift certificate for $200 to one lucky reader who downloads the BHome app on their smartphone and follows FrenchGardenHouse on bHome. The bHome app is one way to enter to win. The winner will be chosen on October 12th, 2015.

answer: FrenchGardenHouse is offering a gift certificate for $200 to one lucky reader who downloads the BHome app on their smart phone and follows FrenchGardenHouse on bHome. The winner is announced on October 12, 2015. The winner has to create an account on bHome, swipe the FrenchGardenHouse star, read the message and tap on the link. Once they do, they are then entered to win the gift certificate.

answer: One FrenchGardenHouse reader will win a $200.00 gift certificate for their store. The bHome app is one way to enter to win. The winner will be chosen on Halloween 2015.

answer: FrenchGardenHouse is offering a gift certificate for $200 to one lucky reader who downloads the BHome app on their smart phone and follows bHome. The winner is announced on October 12, 2015. The winner has to create an account on bHome, swipe the FrenchGardenHouse star, read the message and tap on the link. Once they do, they are then entered to win the gift certificate.

answer: FrenchGardenHouse, a blogger featured on bHome, is holding a giveaway for a $200.00 gift card to the FrenchGardenHouse website. Readers who download the bHome app and follow the FrenchGardenHouse blogger featured are entered to win. Readers can find the FrenchGardenHouse featured profile on the Bhome (bHome app) homepage and they can enter the giveaway using TAP on the bHome app (iPhone, possibly iPad users) and simply read the message and click on the link that the blogger has provided. The giveaway will close at 12:00 a.m. on Sunday, October 12, 2015 and the winner will be announced on that day.


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[Centennial marker at ʻIolani Palace. Kawānanakoa is listed as founder of the Friends of ʻIolani Palace.] HELEN LYDIA KAMAKAʻEHA LILIʻUOKALANI KAWĀNANAKOA (July 22, 1905 – May 19, 1969) was a Hawaiian royal who was a member of the House of Kawānanakoa and the second daughter of Prince David Kawānanakoa and Princess Abigail Campbell Kawānanakoa.

Early life

Born July 22, 1905,[1][2] Liliʻuokalani Kawānanakoa was named after Queen Liliʻuokalani, the last monarch of Hawaii.[3] Having been born after the abolition of the monarchy, she had no official royal title; however, she was still known by many in the Hawaiian community as Princess Liliuokalani.[4][5]

She attended a convent school in San Francisco.[6] During her youth, she was known as the “flapper” princess and sported the then-fashionable bobbed hair.[7][8] Her siblings were David Kalākaua Kawānanakoa and Abigail Kapiʻolani Kawānanakoa.[9]

Marriages and family

Liliʻuokalani married five times. Her first marriage was to Dr. William Jeremiah Ellerbrock on January 17, 1925 at Honolulu.[10] The couple had one daughter before divorcing in 1927:

-   Abigail Kinoiki Kekaulike Kawānanakoa (born 1926).[11][12]

Following the divorce, Abigail was adopted by Liliʻuokalani's mother.[13] Her second marriage was to Charles James Brenham at Niu, August 11, 1928; they also divorced.[14] Her third husband was newspaperman Clark Lee, whom she married in 1938; Lee died of a heart attack in 1953.[15] Her fourth husband, whom she married in 1954, was Charles E. Morris Jr; the couple divorced in 1959, and remarried in 1968.[16]

Legacy and death

She was the founder of the Kona Hawaiian Civic Club in 1952 and was the founder and First President of Friends of ʻIolani Palace from 1966 to 1969.[17][18][19]

She died of cancer at her home in Waialae, Honolulu, on May 19, 1969. At her request, her funeral was a private ceremony with none of the pomp or displays of former Hawaiian royal funerals. She is buried at Nuʻuanu Memorial Park.[20]

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question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about Liliʻuokalani's marriages?

answer: Liliʻuokalani was married five times, to four different men. The first was Dr. William Jeremiah Ellerbrock in 1925 and resulted in one child before a divorce in 1927. In 1928, she was married to and divorced from Charles James Brenham. In 1938, she married Clark Lee, who then died in 1953. In 1954, she married Charles E. Morris Jr., from whom she divorced in 1959 and remarried in 1968.

answer: Liliʻuokalani married five times. Her first marriage was to Dr. William Jeremiah Ellerbrock on January 17, 1925 at Honolulu, two were divorced and two were annulled because of her divorces.

text: This response can be better written to describe the state of the marriages and divorces.

refinement: Liliʻuokalani was married five times, to four different men. The first was Dr. William Jeremiah Ellerbrock in 1925 and resulted in one child before a divorce in 1927. In 1928, she was married to and divorced from Charles James Brenham. In 1938, she married Clark Lee, who then died in 1953. In 1954, she married Charles E. Morris Jr., from whom she divorced in 1959 and remarried in 1968

answer: Liliʻuokalani married five times. Her first marriage was to Dr. William Jeremiah Ellerbrock on January 17, 1925 at Honolulu. Following the divorce, her daughter, Abigail Kinoiki Kekaulike Kawānanakoa was adopted by Liliʻuokalani's mother. Her third husband was newspaper man Clark Lee, who died of a heart attack in 1953. Her fourth husband, Charles E. Morris Jr, the couple divorced in 1959 and remarried in 1968. She died of cancer in 1969.

text: This response is missing the details of the second marriage and the additional detail about her daughter can be deleted. The detail about her dying from cancer can also be omitted.

refinement: Liliʻuokalani married five times. Her first marriage was to Dr. William Jeremiah Ellerbrock on January 17, 1925 at Honolulu. Her second marriage was to Charles James Brenham on August 11, 1928, and they also divorced.  Her third husband was newspaper man Clark Lee, who died of a heart attack in 1953. Her fourth husband, Charles E. Morris Jr, the couple divorced in 1959 and remarried in 1968.

answer: Liliuokalani had five marriages. Her first husband was Dr. William Jeremiah Ellerbrock. They divorced in 1927. Her second marriage was to Charles James Brenham, who died in 1951. Her third husband was Clark Lee, who died in 1953. Her fourth husband was Charles E. Morris Jr, the turned husband and wife separated in 1959 and then remarried in 1969.

answer: Liliʻuokalani married five times, with her first marriage ending in divorce.

text: This response leaves out many important details about the marriages.

refinement: Liliʻuokalani was married five times, to four different men. The first was Dr. William Jeremiah Ellerbrock in 1925 and resulted in one child before a divorce in 1927. In 1928, she was married to and divorced from Charles James Brenham. In 1938, she married Clark Lee, who then died in 1953. In 1954, she married Charles E. Morris Jr., from whom she divorced in 1959 and remarried in 1968.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the Hawaiian monarchy?

answer: The text says that Liliʻuokalani Kawānanakoa was named after the last monarch of Hawaii, having been born after the abolition of the monarchy. She was not a royal by title, but she was still considered a "princess" in the Hawaiian community. The text also mentions that during her youth, she was known as the "flapper" princess and sported the then-fashionable bobbed hair. Her fourth husband, Charles E. Morris Jr, and she remarried in 1968.

text: The last sentence of the response needs to be omitted.

refinement: The text says that Liliʻuokalani Kawānanakoa was named after the last monarch of Hawaii, having been born after the abolition of the monarchy. She was not a royal by title, but she was still considered a "princess" in the Hawaiian community. The text also mentions that during her youth, she was known as the "flapper" princess and sported the then-fashionable bobbed hair.

answer: No answer

text: There is no response to this question. A response needs to be generated.

refinement: The text says that Liliʻuokalani Kawānanakoa was named after the last monarch of Hawaii, having been born after the abolition of the monarchy. She was not a royal by title, but she was still considered a "princess" in the Hawaiian community. The text also mentions that during her youth, she was known as the "flapper" princess and sported the then-fashionable bobbed hair.

answer: The then-fashionable bobbed hair was worn during her youth by Kawānanakoa. She was named after Queen Liliʻuokalani, the last monarch of Hawaii. While in the Hawaiian community she was known as Princess Liliuokalani. Kawānanakoa was the founder of the Kona Hawaiian Civic Club in 1952 and was the founder and First President of Friends of ʻIolani Palace from 1966 to 1969.

text: This response does not discuss much about the Hawaiian monarchy and needs to be edited completely.

refinement: The text says that Liliʻuokalani Kawānanakoa was named after the last monarch of Hawaii, having been born after the abolition of the monarchy. She was not a royal by title, but she was still considered a "princess" in the Hawaiian community. The text also mentions that during her youth, she was known as the "flapper" princess and sported the then-fashionable bobbed hair.

answer: The text says that Liliʻuokalani Kawānanakoa was born after the abolition of the monarchy and had no official royal title. However, she was still known by the Hawaiian community as Princess Liliuokalani.

answer: Liliʻuokalani was born after the monarchy was abolished, but still regarded by many people in the community as princess. She had no royal title. Her parents were a Prince and Princess of the House of Kawānanakoa. She was named after Queen Kawānanakoa, the last monarch of Hawaii.

text: There is a sentence about her parents in this response that is not true and needs to be deleted.

refinement: Liliʻuokalani was born after the monarchy was abolished, but still regarded by many people in the community as princess. She had no royal title. She was named after Queen Kawānanakoa, the last monarch of Hawaii.


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The CHESAPEAKE LOGPERCH (_Percina bimaculata_) is a small species of freshwater ray-finned fish, a darter from the subfamily Etheostomatinae, part of the family Percidae, which also contains the perches, ruffes and pikeperches. It is found in the Chesapeake Bay drainages. It prefers gravel runs and riffles of small to medium-sized rivers.

Distribution

The Chesapeake logperch (_Percina bimaculata_) is located in the Northeast region of the United States. Historically, it is known for being located in the Chesapeake Bay watershed in the district of Columbia, Maryland, Pennsylvania, and Virginia.[1] This range included the lower Susquehanna River basin of Pennsylvania and Maryland, as well as the middle to lower Potomac River basin of Maryland, Virginia, and District of Columbia. However, the Chesapeake logperch's presence has not been recorded from the Potomac River basin since the 1930s and is currently found in the lower Susquehanna River basin as well as Winters Run and the North East River, which drain into the upper portion of the Chesapeake Bay in Maryland.[2]

Habitat

The Chesapeake logperch are freshwater, benthopelgic fish that live near gravel runs and riffles in clear, medium-sized rivers. Flowing pools associated with areas that contain large rocks and boulders are also likely habitats. All known collections have been observed in large river habitats or near the mouth of tributaries that drain into large rivers. Little is known about their reproductive habitats.[3]

Taxonomy

Formerly, the Chesapeake logperch was included in _Percina caprodes_, however, based on morphological and molecular data, Near (2008)[4] determined that it warrants recognition as a distinct species with limited global distribution restricted to the Chesapeake Bay watershed.[5] Currently, the Chesapeake logperch is defined under _Percina bimaculata_ and found under the class Actinopterygii, or ray-finned fishes. Genetic analyses of the Chesapeake logperch revealed multiple morphologically distinct characteristics from the common logperch. The Chesapeake logperch usually has the following combination of characteristics: 7 to 11 irregular lateral bars; orange-yellow band as well as spines located on the anterior dorsal fin (poorly defined in females), nape of adults naked, breast naked except for modified breast scales, supra occipital and preceptorial naked, and no preceptorial blotch. Their scales are generally harsh and rough to the feel, commonly known as having ctenoid scales. Located on the pelvic fin is one spine along with several fin rays which are positioned under the belly, back near the anus in the abdominal position.[6]

Research & Recovery

Currently, the Chesapeake logperch is classified as threatened by the states of Pennsylvania and Maryland due to its limited global distribution within only a small portion of its historical range. In 2019, the U.S. Fish and Wildlife Service (USFWS) funded a project led by the Pennsylvania Fish and Boat Commission (PFBC) to study the life history of the species and begin efforts to restore populations of Chesapeake logperch to previous native habitat where the fish are no longer present. As part of the project, adult brood stock were collected from several tributaries of the Susquehanna River and approximately 1,500 juvenile fish were cultured at laboratories at Conservation Fisheries, Inc. in Knoxville, Tennessee, and under the direction of Distinguished Professor of Ichthyology, Jay Stauffer, Jr., PhD at Penn State University in State College, Pennsylvania. On September 26, 2019, the PFBC along with project partners including the USFWS, Penn State University, Susquehanna River Basin Commission, Pennsylvania Biological Survey, Maryland Department of Natural Resources and Conservation Fisheries, Inc. successfully released 1,500 healthy Chesapeake Logperch juveniles into Chiques Creek, near Columbia, Lancaster County, PA. Future research will include surveys of the area to determine the survival of the introduced fish and gauge natural reproduction and recruitment.

Video

A VIDEO OF THE RESEARCH AND RECOVERY PROJECT WAS PRODUCED BY THE PENNSYLVANIA FISH AND BOAT COMMISSION AND CAN BE FOUND HERE.

[1] http://www.fishandboat.com/Resource/Documents/species-plan-chesapeake-logperch.pdf

[2] http://eol.org/pages/4578171/details

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[4] Near, T. J. 2008. Rescued from synonymy: a redescription of Percina bimaculata Haldeman and a molecular phylogenetic analysis of logperch darters (Percidae: Etheostomatinae). Bull. Peabody Mus. Nat. Hist. 49:1–18.

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title: Chesapeake logperch

question: Where can the Chesapeake logperch be found?

answer: The fish is found in the Chesapeake Bay drainages in the Northeast region of the United States.

text: "It is found in the Chesapeake Bay drainages" is evidence of the species being found in the Chesapeake Bay drainages.

answer: The Chesapeake logperch tends to be found near the mouth of tributaries that run into the Chesapeake Bay.

text: "All known collections have been observed in large river habitats or near the mouth of tributaries" is evidence that the species can be found in the mouth of tributaries.

answer: The Chesapeake logperch is found in the lower Susquehanna River basin as well as Winters Run and the North East River, which drain into the upper portion of the Chesapeake Bay in Maryland.

text: "currently found in the lower Susquehanna River basin as well as Winters Run and the North East River, which drain into the upper portion of the Chesapeake Bay in Maryland" is evidence of the species being found in these locations.

question: Which family does the logperch belong to?

answer: The Chesapeake logperch, a small, freshwater ray-finned fish, is part of the perch family, Percidae.

text: "part of the family Percidae" is evidence of the species belonging to the Percidae family.

answer: The fish belongs to the family Percidae.

text: "part of the family Percidae" is evidence of the fish belonging to the Percidae family.

answer: Molecular analysis determines that the logperch belongs to the Caprodes family, which contains the perches, ruffes and pikeperches.

text: The fish was formerly included in the Caprodes family, however it is part of the Percidae family.

refinement: Molecular analysis determines that the logperch belongs to the Caprodes family, which contains the perches, ruffes and pikeperches.

question: Is the fish still present in the watershed?

answer: Currently, the Chesapeake logperch is located in the Northeast region of the United States but there is some disagreement over whether or not the fish has actually disappeared. Recent evidence suggests restoration efforts are working to bring the species back to certain areas where it has not been seen for years.

text: It fails to mention if the fish is still found in the watershed, which is no longer found there.

refinement: Currently, the Chesapeake logperch is located in the Northeast region of the United States but it has not been recorded in the watershed since the 1930s.

answer: Based on the passage, logperches are no longer present in the Potomac River basin and streams that fed into the Chesapeake Bay until the 1930s—this may have been due to development and pollution. The Chesapeake Logperch are still present, but in limited global distribution restricted to the Chesapeake Bay watershed.

answer: The fish is currently found in the lower Susquehanna River basin. It has not been seen in the Potomac River basin since the 1930s.

text: "has not been recorded from the Potomac River basin since the 1930s and is currently found in the lower Susquehanna River basin" is evidence of where it is no longer found and where it is currently found.

question: Describe the Chesapeake logperch.

answer: The Chesapeake logperch is a small freshwater fish restricted to the Chesapeake Bay watershed, found near clear, riffle-filled rivers. They are have rough and ctenoid scales, often with 7-11 irregular bars, and one spinal stripe near the anal fin. They are classified as threatened due to their restricted range.

text: " 7 to 11 irregular lateral bars; orange-yellow band as well as spines located on the anterior dorsal fin (poorly defined in females), nape of adults naked, breast naked except for modified breast scales, supra occipital and preceptorial naked, and no preceptorial blotch. Their scales are generally harsh and rough to the feel, commonly known as having ctenoid scales. Located on the pelvic fin is one spine along with several fin rays which are positioned under the belly, back near the anus" is evidence of the description of the fish.

answer: The Chesapeake logperch is a small fish that lives around clear riffles and pools in medium-sized rivers. It is currently classified as a threatened species due to its limited distribution in the Chesapeake Bay watershed.

text: "It prefers gravel runs and riffles of small to medium-sized rivers" is evidence of where the fish is found.

answer: The fish generally has seven to eleven irregular lateral bars; an orange-yellow band as well as spines on the anterior dorsal fin. Their scales are usually harsh and rough to feel.

text: It omits mentioning where the fish can be found in its description.

refinement: The fish generally has seven to eleven irregular lateral bars; an orange-yellow band as well as spines on the anterior dorsal fin. Their scales are usually harsh and rough to feel. It can be found around clear riffles and pools in medium-sized rivers.

text: "has the following combination of characteristics: 7 to 11 irregular lateral bars; orange-yellow band as well as spines located on the anterior dorsal fin" is evidence of the description of the fish.

question: Write a ~7 sentence summary.

answer:
Chesapeake logperch is a freshwater ray-finned fish. The fish is found only in the Chesapeake Bay drainages. They live near gravel runs and riffles in clear, medium-sized rivers. The logperch generally has 7 to 11 irregular lateral bars; an orange-yellow band as well as spines located on the anterior dorsal fin.

The fish is classified as threatened by the states of Pennsylvania and Maryland because of its limited global distribution. In 2019, the U.S. Fish and Wildlife Service along with Pennsylvania Fish and Boat Commission have begun efforts to restore the fish to its previously native habitat where it is not currently present.

text: There is no definite evidence that the fish is found only in the Chesapeake bay drainage. However it is found there.

refinement:
Chesapeake logperch is a freshwater ray-finned fish. The fish is found in the Chesapeake Bay drainages. They live near gravel runs and riffles in clear, medium-sized rivers. The logperch generally has 7 to 11 irregular lateral bars; an orange-yellow band as well as spines located on the anterior dorsal fin.

The fish is classified as threatened by the states of Pennsylvania and Maryland because of its limited global distribution. In 2019, the U.S. Fish and Wildlife Service along with Pennsylvania Fish and Boat Commission have begun efforts to restore the fish to its previously native habitat where it is not currently present.

answer: The Chesapeake logperch is a small freshwater fish found in the Chesapeake Bay watershed. This fish is primarily found near riffles in clear, medium-sized rivers, though the range has decreased since the 1930s. The Chesapeake logperch is now considered threatened due to its limited global distribution, though recent efforts have focused on restoration of populations. As part of one such restoration effort, 1,500 juvenile fish were recently reintroduced into Chiques Creek in Pennsylvania.

text: "successfully released 1,500 healthy Chesapeake Logperch juveniles into Chiques Creek, near Columbia, Lancaster County, PA." is evidence that supports the summary.

answer: The Chesapeake logperch is a small fish found in clear, medium-sized rivers in the Chesapeake Bay watershed. It is considered threatened due to its limited range and efforts are currently underway to reintroduce it to habitats it has not been seen in for decades.

text: "The Chesapeake logperch are freshwater, benthopelgic fish that live near gravel runs and riffles in clear, medium-sized rivers" is evidence that supports the summary.

answer: The Chesapeake logperch is a small freshwater fish that lives in the Chesapeake Bay watershed. Currently, it is listed as threatened in Pennsylvania and Maryland due to its restricted range, with recent efforts being undertaken to reintroduce the fish to its original habitat. Efforts have recently been successful in re-introducing 1,500 of the fish into a different river in Pennsylvania, and further research will be carried out to track the fish population's growth and survival.

text: "Future research will include surveys of the area to determine the survival of the introduced fish and gauge natural reproduction and recruitment." is evidence that supports the sumamry.

answer: The Chesapeake logperch (Percina bimaculata) is a species of small freshwater fish which lives near clear, medium-sized rivers with gravel runs and riffles. The species is currently classified as threatened due to its limited global distribution, and there has recently been a project undertaken to reintroduce the Chesapeake logperch into habitats they have not been found in for decades. After much research and preparation, 1,500 juveniles of the Chesapeake logperch were successfully released into Chiques Creek, Pennsylvania on September 26, 2019.

text: "On September 26, 2019, the PFBC along with project partners including the USFWS, Penn State University, Susquehanna River Basin Commission, Pennsylvania Biological Survey, Maryland Department of Natural Resources and Conservation Fisheries, Inc. successfully released 1,500 healthy Chesapeake Logperch juveniles into Chiques Creek, near Columbia, Lancaster County, PA." is evidence that supports the summary.

answer: The Chesapeake logperch is a small freshwater fish that is found in specific regions of the U.S. It prefers to inhabit small to medium-sized rivers with clear water and large rocks or boulders. The fish is currently threatened and efforts are underway to restore populations in Pennsylvania and Maryland, where it is no longer encountered. These efforts include the release of juvenile fish into tributaries in September 2019.

text: The release of juvenile fish were specifically 1,500 healthy Chesapeake Logperch juveniles into Chiques Creek, near Columbia, Lancaster County, PA.

refinement: The Chesapeake logperch is a small freshwater fish that is found in specific regions of the U.S. It prefers to inhabit small to medium-sized rivers with clear water and large rocks or boulders. The fish is currently threatened and efforts are underway to restore populations in Pennsylvania and Maryland, where it is no longer encountered. These efforts include the successful release of 1,500 healthy Chesapeake Logperch juveniles into Chiques Creek, near Columbia, Lancaster County, PA in September 2019.


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From the WebMD Archives
By Alan Mozes

_HealthDay Reporter_

FRIDAY, Jan. 5, 2018 (HealthDay News) -- For people who've battled certain common forms of skin cancer, use of a generic cream called 5-FU may greatly reduce the odds that the disease will come back, new research shows.

The study tracked outcomes for just over 930 U.S. veterans who averaged 70 years of age. All had already been diagnosed with a minimum of two basal cell carcinomas and/or squamous cell carcinomas.

That meant their risk for a skin cancer recurrence was high, the researchers said.

However, just a month's application of 5-FU (fluorouracil 5 percent) appeared to have a lasting impact in preventing a recurrence -- even after use of the cream was stopped. So concludes a study led by Dr. Martin Weinstock, professor of dermatology at Brown University in Providence.

"The most remarkable thing about this study is that now we have something to use that doesn't lose its effectiveness when you stop using it," Weinstock said in a Brown news release.

There was one drawback to the cream treatment, however: About one in every five of the men suffered "severe" skin side effects from using 5-FU, while 40 percent complained of moderate side effects.

One skin cancer specialist who reviewed the findings said that while 5-FU can prevent skin cancers, side effects remain an issue.

"5-FU has been used in the treatment of pre-cancers for decades and is a tried and true treatment, but it comes at a price in side effects and downtime from redness, scaling, irritation and even pain for those being treated," said Dr. Doris Day. She's a dermatologist at Lenox Hill Hospital in New York City.

Adjustments can be made to minimize these effects, she said, but "it is very important to have a thorough and clear discussion to explain what the patient can expect during treatment and to consider treating one area of the face at a time, such as forehead, nose, cheek or chin."

The new four-year trial involved older male veterans, most of whom were white. They'd typically spent a great deal of time in the sun during their service and had already developed at least two cases of a non-melanoma skin cancer.

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The veterans were divided into two groups. For a month, one group applied the 5-FU cream twice per day on their face and ears, while the second group did the same with an inactive placebo cream that didn't contain the active drug.

All were also instructed to regularly use 30 SPF sunscreen.

The result: For men who'd used the active cream, the odds of developing another squamous cell carcinoma -- one bad enough to require surgery -- fell by 75 percent over the following year.

A similar but weaker trend was seen in terms of basal cell carcinomas, the researchers said.

The benefit did seem to fade after a year, the Brown team noted.

Side effects were also somewhat of a general concern, with about one-fifth of the vets reporting "severe" issues in terms of skin sensitivity, reddening and crustiness.

All of the skin reactions cleared up, however, when cream use stopped, and nearly 90 percent of those who had used 5-FU said they would do it again if it helped prevent cancer.

According to Weinstock, "This is the first study of its type. I'm hopeful there will be other studies that show other sorts of regimens that last longer and do a better job over time as science progresses. This is an important first step."

For her part, Day stressed that patients do have choices when it comes to skin cancer care.

"There are also other treatment options that can help clear sun damage" and the odds for a skin cancer, she said, including photodynamic ("light") therapy and a medicinal cream known as imiquimod.

"Patients should know their treatment options and be able to select the one that would be most comfortable and easiest for them," Day said.

The new findings were published online Jan. 3 in _JAMA Dermatology_.

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question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about 5-FU?

answer: 5-FU is a cream used to treat pre-cancers. It is active on skin cancers and reduces the risk of skin cancer by up to 75 percent. Older male veterans participated in a 4-year trial. Compared to people who do not use 5-FU, their risk of suffering more cases of nonmelanoma skin cancers were reduced. However, the cream comes at a price because 1 in 5 men suffered side effects, although insignificantly smaller than the original statistic.

answer: 5-FU, also known as fluorouracil, is a common cream used in the treatment of pre-cancers. It made its first appearance in studies in the 1970s, despite only recently (now) being approved for the treatment of regular skin cancer. It works well in preventing skin cancers from recurring but is not without its side effects. The cream can easily cause sight problems, skin sensitivity, as well as itching and rashes. 5-FU also has pretty terrible effects even a month after use, which is undesirable for patients who may need to use medicines for a measure of time. They may be able to heal the damage 5-FU causes, but the scars may still remain.

answer: 5-FU is a topical cream that can help prevent skin cancers in the face and ears. Side effects, however, remain an issue.

answer: 5-FU (fluorouracil 5 percent) is a generic cream that may greatly reduce the odds that certain common forms of skin cancer coming back after treatment. A month's application of 5-FU on patients diagnosed with a minimum of two basal cell carcinomas and/or squamous cell carcinomas appeared to have a lasting impact in preventing a recurrence even when the cream was stopped. However, while 5-FU can prevent skin cancers, side effects remain an issue.

answer: The text indicates that 5-FU is a generic cream that could help reduce the incidence of recurrence of common forms of skin cancer. The topical application of 5-FU reduced the odds that these veterans would develop another squamous cell carcinoma or basal cell carcinoma over the following year. Some side effects were seen but they were manageable.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the side effects patients get from using 5-FU?

answer: About one in every five of the men in the study suffered "severe" skin side effects from using 5-FU, while 40% complained of moderate side effects. Side effects include redness, scaling, irritation, and even pain, not to mention the downtime patients have to deal with waiting for these effects to heal. Adjustments can be made to minimize side effects. It is also recommended that 5-Fu treatment be done on one area of the face at a time.

answer: The cream has some side effects, including skin sensitivity, reddening and crustiness. However, these side effects typically occurred when the treatment stopped, and most of the patients in the study said they would do the treatment again if it helped prevent skin cancer.

answer: About 20% of patients reported severe skin side effects. 40% of patients reported moderate side effects. While these side effects can be eased, they've been a big issue in dermal treatment. Only 1 in 20 reported no side effects from using 5-FU.

answer: The cream can cause severe side effects, including skin sensitivity, reddening, and crustiness. However, these side effects typically cleared up after use of the cream stopped.

text: This could stand to have some more details.

refinement: About one in every five of the test subjects developed severe side effects, including skin sensitivity, reddening, and crustiness. However, these side effects typically cleared up after use of the cream stopped.

answer: About one fifth of the people in the study reported severe side effects from using the cream. Older men who used it were mostly affected. What side effects did they report? Side effects included skin sensitivity, reddening, scaling, and crustiness. These effects were temporary. People who reported side effects stated that they would use the treatment again.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about Dr. Weinstock and Dr. Day?

answer: Dr. Weinstock is a dermatologist and Dr. Day is a skin cancer specialist. Dr. Weinstock led a study which found that a generic cream called 5-FU helped prevent skin cancer recurrence in older male veterans whose risk for said cancer was high. Dr. Day noted that 5-FU does come with some side effects although its benefits as a prevention measure outweigh that drawback.

answer: Dr. Martin Weinstock is a professor of dermatology at Brown University in Providence. He came up with the study involving 930 U.S. veterans (average age: 70) whose risk for skin cancer recurrence was high. Dr. Doris Day is a dermatologist at Lenox Hill Hospital in New York City. She says that while 5-FU has been a tried and tested treatment for pre-cancer, side effects remain an issue. Dr. Day stresses that there are other treatment options available that can help clear sun damage, including photodynamic (light) therapy, and a medicinal cream known as imiquimod.

answer: Dr. Weinstock is a professor of dermatology at Brown University. His research focuses in preventing the recurrence of skin cancer, which seems to be successful. In his research, a cream called 5-FU was used. There are side effects, according to Day, a dermatologist from New York City and unsympathetic to 5-FU and other regimens, advises patients to seek other options such as light therapy cream imiquimod.

text: The information given about Dr Day could be given in a clearer and more concise manner.

refinement: Dr. Weinstock is a professor of dermatology at Brown University. His research focuses in preventing the recurrence of skin cancer, which seems to be successful. In his research, a cream called 5-FU was used. Dr Day is a dermatologist from NYC. He says there are side effects, according to Day, a dermatologist from New York City and unsympathetic to 5-FU and other regimens, advises patients to seek other options such as light therapy cream imiquimod.

answer: Dr. Martin Weinstock is a professor of medicine at Brown University in Providence, who led the study to see how effective 5-FU creams are in preventing skin recurrences, especially after using them ceasing using them. His colleague, Dr. Doris Day, a dermatologist at Lenox Hill Hospital in New York City thinks that patients should educate themselves on their options and select a treatment method that is most comfortable and easiest for them.

answer: Dr. Weinstock is a professor of dermatology at Brown University who led a study measuring the effectiveness of 5-FU cream in preventing skin cancers. Dr. Day is a dermatologist at Lenox Hill Hospital in New York City. She says that 5-FU does have benefits, but it comes with common side effects.


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No sound, and even though Jack’s eyes are closed he knows wherever he is its very bright. And forcing his eye-lids open with more energy than he had ever used before to do such a task. He brought up an arm to shield himself from a light that most surely wasn’t artificial but was at the same time. As if the light was coming from all around him but nowhere at the same time.

	He tried to speak but found that no words escaped him. And he slowly sat up and looked around to get his bearings. Wherever he was, he’d never seen anything like it before. There appeared to be an expansive stretch of nothingness before him. A long and vast whiteness, He was sure this was a dream, that this feeling of unrelenting sadness gripping him, deep down in the pit of his stomach was just a nightmare that had yet to reveal the punch-line.

Where am I? He thought as he stood up. It took a lot of energy to accomplish this task, his bones and joints were sluggish and clumsy. Once he managed to get to his feet he became dizzy, to the point where he had to put his hands on his knees and bend over for a minute to let it subside.

	Squinting through half closed eyes he tried to look around again and though the light was still very bright it had abated slightly and he could finally stand up straight again. He rubbed a hand over his eyes. He tried to call out again but the words still wouldn’t come. He knew he was speaking but he couldn’t hear anything coming out.

	“There is no use trying to speak.” A woman’s voice came from behind him, seemingly out of the nothingness; A very familiar voice.

	He slowly turned around and was sure that this was a dream. The sight of her made his heart drop, stop and melt all at the same time. He couldn’t remember her name but he knew that he had known this girl very well, knowing every inch of her body and most of her personality.

	She just smiled sadly and took a step forward she moved with a grace and sadness that brought a breaking dread to Jack and he squinted as he watched her move about as if she were gliding along the floor that wasn’t there. This is a dream? He thought to himself and he wasn’t very surprised to hear her speak again. “In a way it is. In a way it is not.” He frowned and looked around again. Where are we?

	“We are everywhere, and nowhere at the same time. We are together again, but apart forever.” She smiled and stepped closer. He suddenly didn’t want her to come any closer and he felt tears forming in his eyes. What do you mean?  She merely smiled. “Is it too bright here? Your eyes haven’t adjusted yet. It will take some time.” She glanced around and as she did the air around him seemed to shift and change.

	And now he was standing in the middle of an old bar. Four pool tables off to the right, and a bar in the middle. The girl was now behind the bar. “Do you remember this place?”  Jack looked around the room. It was empty aside from them. He nodded slowly. It’s where we met. But I can’t remember your name. After all these years, I’ve known you. I’m sorry.

	She just smiled sadly again. “That is not important. My name is no longer a part of your memory.” She moved around the bar and poured a double of whiskey. “This was your favorite wasn’t it?”

	Jack instantly felt something churn in his stomach and he shut his eyes for an instant he heard a sort of siren blaring and then he opened them again, the room had changed once more. They were in his apartment lying in bed. Her head on his chest, her short hair brushed away from her upturned face. “This is where we spent our first night together.” She smiled. And he felt like crying even more. I remember you saying that we had to do this or we’d never know if it was worth it. He thought.

	“Was it worth it?” She asked and kissed his collar bone lightly. An icy chill ran up his spine. He shuddered. Every single second of it.

	“Every second.” She sighed and he felt her cool hand intertwine with his. “I need to tell you something Jack.” I know, This isn’t a dream…  He felt the tears now, they had been escaping the corners of his eyes for who knew how long. What happened? Where are we?

	He shut his eyes and the blaring siren slipped back in for a moment And the voices of people shouting in the distance.

	“You are dying. People say that your life flashes before your eyes before you die…” Her voice was getting distant. Further away and Jack squeezed his arms around her holding her close. The body he held tightly. Don’t leave me. Please Don’t leave me! The sirens were stronger now piercing the walls of his subconscious.

	“You have to make a choice.” She said. Her voice was distant and muddled now. “I Hate to give you such a cliché ultimatum but you have a choice to make.” Jack nodded his head, the room around him swam and rippled seeming to meld the moldy ceiling of his apartment with a starry night sky. “Stay here with me. Or go back.” Her voice was coming in a little stronger now. What happened? Where’s back, why aren’t you there?

 	“Do I really have to say it?” She sat up on her elbow and looked down at him. And he knew there from the sadness in her eyes and the way she smiled soothingly down at him. He reached a hand up and ran a thumb along her jaw-line. “All you have to do is choose. There is still time. Go back.”

And with that he knew what he had to do. He brought both hands up to hold her face gently in his hands and he pulled her down close to him so that their noses were touching. And he was able to find his voice. “There is no life for me, without you.” And he smiled.

	She frowned for a moment and scrunched her nose up. “Are you sure?” She asked. And he smiled.

“From the moment I saw  you, Ash...”

	The ambulance rumbled along the lonely stretch of Arizona highway, and the coroner’s van behind it. “Jimmy, turn off the siren… We’ve lost him.” The paramedic paused checking his watch. Sat up and removed his rubber gloves. “CPR is unsuccessful. We can’t work him back up.”

title: "Ash" By FallenMonument

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the conflicts in the story.

answer: Jack is lost and confused in white light and trying to get his bearings. He is in some sort of purgatory, perhaps, that replaced this reality.  Then he is with a woman, his companion from the past, whom he says he can't remember her name. He appears to be dying and she tells him he has to choose: stay with her or go. All he has to do is choose. If he does not choose, there can be no return for him to this realm.

text: Last line is unnecessary.

refinement: Jack is lost and confused in white light and trying to get his bearings. He is in some sort of purgatory, perhaps, that replaced this reality.  Then he is with a woman, his companion from the past, whom he says he can't remember her name. He appears to be dying and she tells him he has to choose: stay with her or go. All he has to do is choose.

text: Rather than purgatory, it is more accurate to say he is in a state between life and death.

refinement: Jack is lost and confused in white light and trying to get his bearings. He is in a state between life and death with his life flashing before his eyes.  Then he is with a woman, his companion from the past, whom he says he can't remember her name. He appears to be dying and she tells him he has to choose: stay with her or go. All he has to do is choose.

text: The phrasing could be clearer in the line with Ash.

refinement: Jack is lost and confused in white light and trying to get his bearings. He is in a state between life and death with his life flashing before his eyes. He is visited by Ash, the love of his life, though he cannot remember her name at first. He appears to be dying and she tells him he has to choose: stay with her or go. All he has to do is choose.

text: Last line unnecessary.

refinement: Jack is lost and confused in white light and trying to get his bearings. He is in a state between life and death with his life flashing before his eyes. He is visited by Ash, the love of his life, though he cannot remember her name at first. He appears to be dying and she tells him he has to choose: stay with her or go.

answer: Jack is in a dream state, and he is with a woman he has known in the past. He is trying to remember her name, but he can't. They are in a bar, and then in his apartment. She tells him he is dying, and he chooses to go back.

text: The choice should be framed as a conflict.

refinement: Jack is in a dream state, and he is with a woman he has known in the past. He is trying to remember her name, but he can't. They are in a bar, and then in his apartment. She tells him he is dying, and he has to choose between staying with her in the afterlife or going back to the world of the living.

answer: The main conflict is that Jack is trying to figure out where he is and what is happening to him. The woman he sees is telling him that he is dying. Jack doesn't want to lose her, so he chooses to stay with her.

answer: Jack wakes up to pure light, confusing and blinding. "Jack, you're dying" the woman tells him. Jack feels every second was worth it. The next thing he remembers is paramedics trying to give him CPR through he doesn't wake up.

text: The line where Jack feels every second was worth it is unclear without context (and also not relevant to the conflict).

refinement: Jack wakes up to pure light, confusing and blinding. "Jack, you're dying" the woman tells him. The next thing he remembers is paramedics trying to give him CPR through he doesn't wake up.

text: The last line should highlight the choice he has to make.

refinement: Jack wakes up to pure light, confusing and blinding. "Jack, you're dying" the woman tells him. She tells him that he has to choose between remaining in the afterlife with her or returning to the world of the living.

answer: Jack wakes up to pure light, confusing and blinding. He feels himself remembering the night he met a woman he has images in his head of. He starts to hear her voice. She appears to take him back to previous times they had together and Jack feels every second was worth it. The next thing he remembers is paramedics trying to give him CPR through he doesn't wake up.

answer: Jack is in a dream state, and he is with a woman he has known in the past. He is trying to remember her name, but he can't. They are in a bar, and then in his apartment. She tells him he is dying, and he chooses to stay with her.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize how Jack feels about the woman.

answer: Jack seems to have loved her very much, despite the fact that he can't remember her name. He wishes he could remember her name, but realizes she isn't important, which is why she doesn't answer his question. He's seen her many times and remembers each instance of their meetings. When he sees her body in his apartment, his heart seems to break at the sight. He's also crying as he realizes she will be leaving him, something he doesn't want her to do. It's clear he wants to live, but since he's lost her and is about to die he can't imagine living a life without her.

text: It is incorrect to state that Jack realizes she isn't important.

refinement: Jack seems to have loved her very much, despite the fact that he can't remember her name. He wishes he could remember her name. He's seen her many times and remembers each instance of their meetings. When he sees her body in his apartment, his heart seems to break at the sight. He's also crying as he realizes she will be leaving him, something he doesn't want her to do. It's clear he wants to live, but since he's lost her and is about to die he can't imagine living a life without her.

text: The answer should mention his choice at the end of the story.

refinement: Jack seems to have loved her very much, despite the fact that he can't remember her name. He wishes he could remember her name. He's seen her many times and remembers each instance of their meetings. When he sees her body in his apartment, his heart seems to break at the sight. He's also crying as he realizes she will be leaving him, something he doesn't want her to do. It's clear he wants to live, but since he's lost her and is about to die he can't imagine living a life without her. When faced with the choice of returning to his life or remaining in the afterworld with her, he chooses the stay with her.

answer: Jack feels a mysterious sadness about the woman. He knows her body very well, loves her and her personality, but he doesn't have her name. He doesn't want her to leave and feels drawn to her even when she is telling him that he is dying and making him choose between life and death.

answer: Jack feels a mysterious sadness about the woman. He knows her body very well, loves her and her personality. He doesn't want her to leave and feels drawn to her even when she is telling him that he is dying and making him choose between life and death.

answer: Jack seems to be in love with the woman. He knows her well and can recognize her voice. He is sad that he can't remember her name. Jack is upset that she has to leave him.

answer: Jack feels a deep sadness when he sees the woman. He feels as if he has known her for a long time but cannot remember her name. He feels the need to tell her something, but does not know what.

text: The statement that he feels the need to tell her something is unattested,

refinement: Jack feels a deep sadness when he sees the woman. He feels as if he has known her for a long time but cannot remember her name.

text: The answer should mention the choice he makes.

refinement: Jack feels a deep sadness when he sees the woman. He feels as if he has known her for a long time but cannot remember her name. The woman tells him that he is dying and must choose between returning to his life or staying with her in the afterlife. He chooses to die so that he can stay with her.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the plot twist.

answer: The woman was in the process of slipping into a lucid dream which would have been quite possibly the most glorious experience of her life. However, everything changes when her Jimmy, Jack, is yelling and disturb her peaceful seduction. Ultimately, she is resigned to the fact that they can never return to that passion filled evening. Jimmy leaves a seemingly effortless trail of events that ultimately ended as seen by Jack as he slipped into death.

text: This answer is inaccurate, failing to mention that Jack is in a state between life and death.

refinement: The plot twist is that Jack is dying and is in a state between life and death. His past love visits him and offers him a choice: he can either go back to his life or he can die and stay in the afterlife with her.

answer: The woman tells Jack that he will die if he chooses to stick with her. Jack chooses death and she leaves. These turn out to be flashbacks of him being in an ambulance and then in a morgue where the paramedics are trying to resuscitate him.

answer: At the outset, nothing seems amiss. Jack and the woman are in a dreamscape containing memories and places they shared together. When Jack begins to question how they are wherever they are, the woman informs him he's dying. The woman gives Jack two choices: staying in the dream or returning. Just then, the paramedics arrive to pronounce him dead.

text: Rather than simply calling it a "dream" the answer should make clear that he is in a state between life and death.

refinement: At the outset, nothing seems amiss. Jack and the woman are in a dreamscape containing memories and places they shared together. When Jack begins to question how they are wherever they are, the woman informs him he's dying. The woman gives Jack two choices: staying in the afterlife with her or returning to the world of the living. Just then, the paramedics arrive to pronounce him dead.

answer: Jack chooses death and returns to the world of the living with the woman guiding him. These turn out to be flashbacks of him being in an ambulance and then in a morgue where the paramedics are trying to resuscitate him.

answer: Jack wakes up and sees a woman who he thinks is his dead lover. He asks her who she is. She tells him that he is dying and that he has a choice to make. He can stay with her or go back. He chooses to stay with her and she tells him he is dead.

answer: The story begins with Jack waking up in a strange place. He is unable to speak or hear anything. He is able to walk, but feels sluggish. He sees a woman, and knows her very well. She tells him that they are together again, but apart forever. She takes him to a bar, and then to his apartment. She tells him he is dying, and that he has a choice. He chooses to stay with her, and dies in the ambulance.

text: This is a summary of the whole story rather than the plot twist.

refinement: She tells him he is dying, and that he has a choice. He chooses to stay with her, and dies in the ambulance.

text: The choice Jack has to make can be clarified.

refinement: The woman tells Jack he is dying, and that he has a choice to stay in the afterlife with her or return to his life. He chooses to stay with her, and dies in the ambulance.

answer: The story begins with Jack waking up in a strange place. He is unable to speak or hear anything. He is able to walk, but feels sluggish. He sees a woman, and knows her very well. She tells him that they are together again, but apart forever. She takes him to a bar, and then to his apartment. She tells him he is dying, and that he has a choice. He chooses to stay with her, and dies in the ambulance. The twist is that the woman is actually a paramedic working on him.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize how Jack died.

answer: No answer

answer: Jack died in an accident while driving.

text: This is unattested

answer: No answer

answer: Jack was driving, he heard a siren and fell unconscious. CPR was unsuccessful. The paramedics called it and quit trying to revive him.

answer: No answer

answer: Jack was driving, he heard a siren and fell unconscious. When he woke up he was unable to move, he could only watch as his vehicle hit with a semi.

answer: Jack died in an accident while driving. He was hit by a truck.


text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid made by combining two parts hydrogen and one part oxygen. It is a principle component of every fruit and vegetable as well as making up a large portion of living things. It can be used in a wide variety of dishes, can be a beverage on its own and can be used as a cleaner and even a solvent. Water freezes at 32°F (0°C) and boils at 212°F (100°C). When frozen, it takes a solid form called "ice", which can also be used in a variety of ways. When boiling, can be used to cook pasta and eggs.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How is water made?

answer: Water is made by combining two parts hydrogen and one part oxygen.

text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid made by combining two parts hydrogen and one part oxygen.

answer: Water is made by combining two parts hydrogen and one part oxygen.

text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid made by combining two parts hydrogen and one part oxygen.

answer: By combining two parts hydrogen with one part oxygen.

text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid made by combining two parts hydrogen and one part oxygen.

answer: Water is made by combining two parts hydrogen with one part oxygen.

text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid made by combining two parts hydrogen and one part oxygen.

answer: Water is made by combining two parts hydrogen and one part oxygen.

text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid made by combining two parts hydrogen and one part oxygen.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

At what temperature does water freeze?

answer: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C).

text: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C)

answer: Water freezes at 32 degrees Fahrenheit and 0 degrees Celsius.

text: Use proper scientific notation.

text: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C)

answer: Water freezes at 32 degrees Celsius.

text: Use proper scientific notation

text: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C)

answer: Water freezes at 32°F

text: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C)

answer: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C).

text: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C)

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

At what temperatures does water boil?

answer: Water boils at a temperature of 212°F (100°C).

text: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C) and boils at 212°F (100°C).

answer: Water boils at 212°F

text: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C) and boils at 212°F (100°C).

answer: 86

text: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C) and boils at 212°F (100°C).

answer: Water boils at 212 degrees Fahrenheit and 100 degrees Celsius.

text: Use scientific notation

text: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C) and boils at 212°F (100°C).

answer: Water boils at 212°F (100°C).

text: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C) and boils at 212°F (100°C).

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What is the frozen form of water called?

answer: Water freezes into ice when cooled below 32°F (0°C).

text: When frozen, it takes a solid form called "ice"

answer: Ice is the frozen form of water.

text: When frozen, it takes a solid form called "ice"

answer: The frozen form of water is called ice.

text: When frozen, it takes a solid form called "ice"

answer: It is called "ice".

text: When frozen, it takes a solid form called "ice"

answer: Ice.

text: When frozen, it takes a solid form called "ice"

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How is water described in this excerpt?

answer: Water is described as a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid.

text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid

answer: Water is described as cheap and versatile.

text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid

answer: Water is clear, odorless, tasteless, versatile, and inexpensive.

text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid

answer: Water is described as clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive, and versatile.

text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid

answer: Water is an odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid. It is a principle component of every fruit, vegetable and living thing and can be used as a beverage, a cleaner and a solvent. It freezes at 32°F and boils at 212°F.

text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid

text: It is a principle component of every fruit and vegetable as well as making up a large portion of living things.

text: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C) and boils at 212°F (100°C).

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless liquid which can be used in cooking, cleaning, and as a beverage. It freezes at 32°F (0°C) and boils at 212°F (100°C).

text: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C) and boils at 212°F (100°C).

text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid

answer: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive, and versatile liquid. It exists in nearly all forms of life, can be used in cooking, and can be used for a variety of purposes around the house. It freezes at 32°F and boils at 212°F.

text: Over 2 sentences

refinement: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive, and versatile liquid. It freezes at 32°F and boils at 212°F.

text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid

text: It is a principle component of every fruit and vegetable as well as making up a large portion of living things

text: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C) and boils at 212°F (100°C).

answer: This excerpt describes water and its composition and properties. It explains when water boils and freezes and the forms it can take on.

text: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C) and boils at 212°F (100°C).

text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid made by combining two parts hydrogen and one part oxygen.

answer: This text is about water, a clear odorless tasteless and versatile liquid made by combining two parts hydrogen and one part oxygen. It freezes and boils at specific temperatures.

text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid made by combining two parts hydrogen and one part oxygen.

text: Water freezes at 32°F (0°C) and boils at 212°F (100°C)

answer: This is a brief outline of water. It is a clear tasteless and odorless liquid that can be used in medicinal cookery as well as a variety of industries.

text: It is used for cooking and a variety of ways

refinement: This is a brief outline of water. It is a clear tasteless and odorless liquid that can be used in cooking and a variety of ways.

text: Water is a clear, odorless, tasteless, inexpensive and versatile liquid

text: When frozen, it takes a solid form called "ice", which can also be used in a variety of ways. When boiling, can be used to cook pasta and eggs.