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_CENTURION_ is a historical fiction novel () written by Simon Scarrow, published by Headline Book Publishing in 2007. It is book 8 in the _Eagles of the Empire_ series, continuing Macro and Cato's adventures in the eastern provinces of the Roman Empire that began in _The Eagle in the Sand_.

Summary

During the 1st century AD, a force of the Parthian Empire destroys a vexillation of a Roman auxiliary cohort sent to construct a fort on the banks of the Euphrates in the Kingdom of Palmyra. The garrison is slaughtered. Meanwhile, with tensions rising between Rome and Parthia, the Legio X Fretensis, Legio III Gallica and the Legio VI Ferrata are drilling for war in Syria. Prefect Macro and Centurion Cato are drilling the Second Illyrian, an auxiliary cohort, attached to the Legio X Fretensis for the looming war.

Cato and Macro were sent to Syria by Narcissus to gather proof that the governor of Syria, Longinus was planning to use the Syrian legions to usurp the Emperor Claudius. During their time in Antioch, Crisups, a Roman legionary, murders an auxiliary leading to Crispus' execution, much to the chagrin of the legionaries. A Parthian convoy arrives, delivering the head of Centurion Castor, the soldier who commanded the Euphrates fort, and warns of Parthian intervention, should Rome continue to be seen to be annexing Palmyra. Shortly thereafter, a Roman soldier arrives at the behest of Lucius Sempronius, a Roman ambassador to Palmyra, informing Longinus that Palmyra has descended into civil war.

Artaxes, the son of Palmyran king Vabathus, has raised an army and laid siege to the Palmyran loyalists in the Royal Citadel. Fearing the Parthians will arrive before the Romans can, Longinus sends the Second Illyrian and a cohort of the Legio X Fretensis to reinforce the loyalists. Along the way, the Roman force is aided by Prince Balthus, who covets the Palmyran throne, despite not being Vabathus' first born. The Romans and Balthus' men fight their way through to the city and manage to reinforce the loyalist troops, mainly composed of Greek mercenaries. Following a banquet to celebrate the successful defence of a rebel assault, Amethus, one of Vabathus' sons is found murdered, with Balthus being the prime suspect. Meanwhile, Cato meets Sempronius' daughter, Julia, and the two fall in love after an uneasy start.

After a rebel bombardment, the loyalist food stores are all but destroyed. Cato attempts to bluff Artaxes into standing down, however before Artaxes can respond, Longinus arrives with two legions and several auxiliary units. Longinus privately reveals to Cato and Macro that they were never meant to reach Palmyra, and were meant to die in the desert, removing Narcissus' spies that had frustrated his plans. Against the advice of Cato, Longinus leads the legions into the desert, determined to destroy Artaxes and his Parthian allies. During a night attack, Longinus panics, orders a retreat and leaves the army at the mercy of the Parthian horsemen. On the suggestions of Cato, the army manages to trap the Parthians, destroying their army. Balthus orders his brother, Artaxes, killed, leaving him the sole heir to Vabathus' throne.

Back in Palmyra, it is revealed Balthus had ordered his slave, Carpex, to murder Amethus. Balthus is arrested to be put to death. With no heir to succeed the king, Sempronius reveals that the empire will annex Palmyra and absorb it into the province of Syria. Macro and Cato are released from Narcissus' employment, ending their posting in the East. Sempronius later gives Cato his consent to marry his daughter, Julia.

Main characters

Romans

-   Centurion Quintus Lucinius Cato - Temporarily promoted to Acting Prefect of the Second Illyrian Cohort, Macro's adjutant
-   Prefect Lucinius Cornelius Macro - Prefect of the Second Illyrian Cohort
-   Legate Gallus Amatius - Commanding officer of the Tenth legion
-   Centurion Parmenion - Centurion of the Second Illyrian, serves as Cato's adjutant
-   Centurion Castor - Centurion of the Tenth legion, killed in action when the Parthians destroy his fort
-   Centurion Horatius - Centurion of the Tenth legion
-   Centurion Braccus - Centurion of the Tenth legion
-   Centurion Septimus - Centurion of the Tenth legion
-   Centurion Porcius Cimber - Centurion of the Tenth legion
-   Optio Marcus Metellus Crispus - Optio of the Tenth legion, he is put to death for murdering an auxiliary
-   Centurion Metellus - Centurion of the Second Illyrian
-   Centurion Aquila - Centurion of the Second Illyrian, commander of the cohort's cavalry contingent
-   Caius Menathus - Cavalryman of the Second Illyrian
-   Gaius Cassius Longinus - Governor of Syria
-   Lucius Sempronius - Roman ambassador, sent to Palmyra to conclude a treaty
-   Julia Sempronia - Sempronius' daughter-turned-surgeon, who falls in love with Cato

Palmyrans

-   King Vabathus - Sovereign of Palmyra
-   Prince Amethus - First son of Vabathus. He is assassinated by Carpex, under orders from Balthus
-   Prince Balthus - Second son of Vabathus, ruthlessly coveting his father's throne. He is later put to death by Vabathus for treason
-   Prince Artaxes - Third son of Vabathus, and his favourite son. He leads the rebels against his father, and is later killed on Balthus' orders in battle
-   Thermon - The King's Chamberlain and younger brother. He was castrated under orders from the King to prevent any competition in the Royal lineage
-   Krathos - A Palmyran minister who uses the easily persuaded Amethus to further his own agendas
-   Demetrius - Commander of the Royal Guard
-   Archaelaus - Tetrach of the Second Syntagma of the Royal Guard
-   Carpex - A slave of Balthus who assassinates Amethus on his orders. Carpex is later murdered by Balthus once he exposes the prince
-   Jesmiah - A Palmyran civilian, who cares for her baby brother, Ayshel

Parthians

-   Metaxes - Prince and heir to the throne of Parthia, sent to warn Longinus of Parthian intervention

Novel Website

-   Scarrow Brothers

Notes

After _Eagle in the Sand_, Headline Book Publishing reportedly decided not to use titles with the word Eagle anymore to attract new fans.

Reviews

-   Review in the Coventry Telegraph, April 21 2008. Reviewed by Ted Jury
-   Review at Yorkshire Evening Post, 22 March 2008. Reviewed by RC
-   Review by Jill Murphy at The Bookbag
-   Review at FantasticFiction.co.uk

Best-seller listing

-   The Sunday Times (London) list of fiction hardback bestsellers

Category:2007 British novels Category:Eagles of the Empire Category:Novels set in the 1st century

title: Centurion (novel)

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize everything in the novel's plot summary relating to characters being killed.

answer: The Parthian convoy delivers the head of Centurion Castor, who was killed when the Parthians destroyed his fort, to their king Longinus, who is to blame for the murder. Crispus is murdered after killing an auxiliary. Amethus, one of Vabathus's sons, is discovered murdered, with Balthus as the prime suspect.

text: The Parthian convoy delivered the head of Centurion Castor, who was killed along with his garrison when they attacked the fort they were constructing on the Euphrates. Change the response to include the garrison that was also killed as well as the fort that was being constructed on the Euphrates.

refinement: The Parthian convoy delivers the head of Centurion Castor, who was killed along with his garrison when the Parthians attacked the fort they were constructing on the Euphrates river, to their king Longinus, who is to blame for the murder. Crispus is murdered after killing an auxiliary. Amethus, one of Vabathus's sons, is discovered murdered, with Balthus as the prime suspect.

text: Crispus is executed as punishment for murdering the auxiliary. Change the response to reflect the reason for Crispus' death.

refinement: The Parthian convoy delivers the head of Centurion Castor, who was killed along with his garrison when the Parthians attacked the fort they were constructing on the Euphrates river, to their king Longinus, who is to blame for the murder. Crispus is executed after murdering an auxiliary. Amethus, one of Vabathus's sons, is discovered murdered, with Balthus as the prime suspect.

text: It is later revealed that Amethus was murdered by Balthus' slave Carpex on his orders. Include this information in the answer.

refinement: The Parthian convoy delivers the head of Centurion Castor, who was killed along with his garrison when the Parthians attacked the fort they were constructing on the Euphrates river, to their king Longinus, who is to blame for the murder. Crispus is executed after murdering an auxiliary. Amethus, one of Vabathus's sons, is murdered by Carpex on Balthus' orders.

text: Balthus moves to eliminate his other brother that stands between him and the throne, with this motive Artaxes is murdered. Include this killing in the response.

refinement: The Parthian convoy delivers the head of Centurion Castor, who was killed along with his garrison when the Parthians attacked the fort they were constructing on the Euphrates river, to their king Longinus, who is to blame for the murder. Crispus is executed after murdering an auxiliary. Amethus, one of Vabathus's sons, is murdered by Carpex on Balthus' orders. Balthus murders his other brother, Artaxes, as well.

text: Finally, it is discovered that Balthus was responsible for killing his brothers and is executed. Include this final result in the response.

refinement: The Parthian convoy delivers the head of Centurion Castor, who was killed along with his garrison when the Parthians attacked the fort they were constructing on the Euphrates river, to their king Longinus, who is to blame for the murder. Crispus is executed after murdering an auxiliary. Amethus, one of Vabathus's sons, is murdered by Carpex on Balthus' orders. Balthus murders his other brother, Artaxes, as well. It is discovered that he is responsible for killing Amethus and Artaxes, and Balthus himself is executed.

answer: The Parthians destroy a Roman fort; the Second Illyrian is sent to reinforce the loyalists at Palmyra and meets the Parthians on the way. During the ensuing battle, Centurion Castor is killed and Centurion Horatius is injured. Centurion Braccus is also killed. In Palmyra, Amethus is assassinated and Balthus is arrested for this crime. Finally, Artaxes is killed in battle.

text: Centurion Braccus is not killed. Remove this information from the response.

refinement: The Parthians destroy a Roman fort; the Second Illyrian is sent to reinforce the loyalists at Palmyra and meets the Parthians on the way. During the ensuing battle, Centurion Castor is killed and Centurion Horatius is injured. In Palmyra, Amethus is assassinated and Balthus is arrested for this crime. Finally, Artaxes is killed in battle.

text: Crispus is executed for murdering an auxiliary. Include this information in the response.

refinement: The Parthians destroy a Roman fort; the Second Illyrian is sent to reinforce the loyalists at Palmyra and meets the Parthians on the way. During the ensuing battle, Centurion Castor is killed and Centurion Horatius is injured. A Roman legionary Crispus murders an auxiliary in Antioch, and is executed. In Palmyra, Amethus is assassinated and Balthus is arrested for this crime. Finally, Artaxes is killed in battle.

text: Balthus is responsible for killing both Amethus and Artaxes. He is executed after this is discovered. Change the order of the words to reflect the link between the murders of Amethus and Artaxes.

refinement: The Parthians destroy a Roman fort; the Second Illyrian is sent to reinforce the loyalists at Palmyra and meets the Parthians on the way. During the ensuing battle, Centurion Castor is killed and Centurion Horatius is injured. A Roman legionary Crispus murders an auxiliary in Antioch, and is executed. In Palmyra, Amethus and Artaxes are assassinated. Balthus is arrested for these crime and executed.

answer: The Parthian Empire slaughters a Roman garrison. Crisups, a Roman legionary, murders an auxiliary, which results in Crispus's execution. A Parthian convoy delivers the head of Centurion Castor. Amethus, one of Vabathus's sons, is found murdered. Balthus orders his brother Artaxes killed. It is also revealed that Balthus ordered his slave to murder Amethus. Balthus is arrested and put to death.

answer: In the novel, Centurion Castor is killed when the Parthians attack his fort. During the campaign to save Palmyra from the rebel army, several other Roman and Palmyran characters are killed. These include Centurion Porcius Cimber, Prince Amethus, Prince Artaxes, Carpex, and Prince Balthus.

text: Crispus murdered an auxiliary while they were in Antioch and was executed. Include this killing in the response.

refinement: In the novel, Centurion Castor is killed when the Parthians attack his fort. During the campaign to save Palmyra from the rebel army, several other Roman and Palmyran characters are killed. These include Centurion Porcius Cimber, Crispus and the auxiliary he murdered, Prince Amethus, Prince Artaxes, Carpex, and Prince Balthus.

text: Carpex, Balthus' slave, is not killed. Carpex was ordered by Balthus to kill Amethus, and was not killed himself. Remove Carpex's name from the response.

refinement: In the novel, Centurion Castor is killed when the Parthians attack his fort. During the campaign to save Palmyra from the rebel army, several other Roman and Palmyran characters are killed. These include Centurion Porcius Cimber, Crispus and the auxiliary he murdered, Prince Amethus, Prince Artaxes, and Prince Balthus.

answer: In the beginning of the story, the Parthians slaughter a Roman legion at the Euphrates, killing Centurion Castor in the process. Centurion Castor commanded the Euphrates fort and commanded several auxiliary units. Carpex kills Prince Amethus under the orders of Prince Balthus. Carpex is later murdered by Prince Balthus. King Vabathus' sons Amethus and Artaxes are both killed. Balthus is also killed by his brother King Artaxes.

text: The sentence describing Centurion Castor's command is not applicable to the question. Remove this sentence from the response 'Centurion Castor commanded the Euphrates fort and commanded several auxiliary units.'.

refinement: In the beginning of the story, the Parthians slaughter a Roman legion at the Euphrates, killing Centurion Castor in the process. Carpex kills Prince Amethus under the orders of Prince Balthus. Carpex is later murdered by Prince Balthus. King Vabathus' sons Amethus and Artaxes are both killed. Balthus is also killed by his brother King Artaxes.

text: Crispus murdered an auxiliary while they were in Antioch and was executed. Include this killing in the response.

refinement: In the beginning of the story, the Parthians slaughter a Roman legion at the Euphrates, killing Centurion Castor in the process. Carpex kills Prince Amethus under the orders of Prince Balthus. Crispus, a Roman legionary, murders an auxiliary and is executed for it. Carpex is later murdered by Prince Balthus. King Vabathus' sons Amethus and Artaxes are both killed. Balthus is also killed by his brother King Artaxes.

text: Amethus and Artaxes are both assasinated on Balthus' orders. Balthus, himself, is executed when this information comes to light. Reorder the sentences and remove the superfluous sentences to reflect the murder of the two brothers at the hands of the third.

refinement: In the beginning of the story, the Parthians slaughter a Roman legion at the Euphrates, killing Centurion Castor in the process. Carpex kills Prince Amethus under the orders of Prince Balthus. Crispus, a Roman legionary, murders an auxiliary and is executed for it. Carpex is later murdered by Prince Balthus. King Vabathus' sons Amethus and Artaxes are both killed and Balthus is executed for their murders.

text: Carpes, Balthus' slave, is not murdered. Remove this information from the response.

refinement: In the beginning of the story, the Parthians slaughter a Roman legion at the Euphrates, killing Centurion Castor in the process. Carpex kills Prince Amethus under the orders of Prince Balthus. Crispus, a Roman legionary, murders an auxiliary and is executed for it. King Vabathus' sons Amethus and Artaxes are both killed and Balthus is executed for their murders.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the story's romance subplot.

answer: The romance between Cato and Julia Sempronia is initially fraught but eventually survived. They extended to develop feelings for each other. At the end of the story, Julian Sempronia's father, Lucius Sempronia, visits Macro and Cato and later gives Cato his consent to marry her.

text: Julia's last name is Sempronius. Correct the spelling in the response.

refinement: The romance between Cato and Julia Sempronius is initially fraught but eventually survived. They extended to develop feelings for each other. At the end of the story, Julian Sempronius' father, Lucius Sempronius, visits Macro and Cato and later gives Cato his consent to marry her.

text: Remove the word 'extended' from the second sentence to make the sentence easier to read.

refinement: The romance between Cato and Julia Sempronius is initially fraught but eventually survived. They developed feelings for each other. At the end of the story, Julian Sempronius' father, Lucius Sempronius, visits Macro and Cato and later gives Cato his consent to marry her.

answer: Cato meets Sempronius's daughter, Julia, and they fall in love after an uneasy start. Sempronius later gives Cato consent to marry Julia.

answer: Centurion Cato falls in love with Sempronius' daughter, Julia, despite initially having a difficult relationship. Julia also falls in love with Cato, and the two eventually get Sempronius' consent to marry.

answer: A huge romance occurs in the story between Cato and Julia with the latter being Lucius Sempronius' daughter. There was a lot of unexpected feelings because both characters did not initially like one another. Cato was still in love with Tamara from the past, Sempronius' daughter Julia was attracted to a local lad but Cato's expert knowledge impressed her.

text: At the end of the book, Sempronius gives his consent for Cato to marry his daughter. Include this information in the response.

refinement: A huge romance occurs in the story between Cato and Julia with the latter being Lucius Sempronius' daughter. There was a lot of unexpected feelings because both characters did not initially like one another. Cato was still in love with Tamara from the past, Sempronius' daughter Julia was attracted to a local lad but Cato's expert knowledge impressed her. At the end of the book, Sempronius gives his consent for Cato to marry his daughter.

answer: Cato falls in love with Julia Sempronia, the daughter of Roman ambassador Lucius Sempronia, while posted in Syria. Despite initial reservations, Julia reciprocates Cato's love. Meanwhile, Prince Balthus is revealed to have ordered the murder of Amethus, the son of King Vabathus. Longinus panics and retreats when his army is attacked by the Parthians, and later is put to death for treason. Ultimately, it is revealed that Palmyra would be annexed by Rome, ending Prince Artaxes' reign.

text: Only the first two sentences have bearing on the question. Remove the other sentences that does not include information on the romance subplot.

refinement: Cato falls in love with Julia Sempronia, the daughter of Roman ambassador Lucius Sempronia, while posted in Syria. Despite initial reservations, Julia reciprocates Cato's love.

text: Julia's last name is Sempronius. Correct the spelling in the response.

refinement: Cato falls in love with Julia Sempronius, the daughter of Roman ambassador Lucius Sempronius, while posted in Syria. Despite initial reservations, Julia reciprocates Cato's love.

text: At the end of the book, Sempronius gives Cato his consent to marry his daughter, Julia. Include this information on their engagement in the response.

refinement: Cato falls in love with Julia Sempronius, the daughter of Roman ambassador Lucius Sempronius, while posted in Syria. Despite initial reservations, Julia reciprocates Cato's love. At the end of the book, Sempronius gives Cato his consent to marry his daughter.


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THE ROTTED were an English death metal/d-beat band formed in England in early 2008.

History

The band was formed from the ashes of death metal / grindcore ensemble Gorerotted by ex-members Ben Rotted, Tim Carley, and Phil Wilson, along with Gian Pyres (ex-Cradle Of Filth, Extreme Noise Terror, Christian Death, Screamin' Daemon) and Nate Gould (Ex-Screamin' Daemon) due to a musical progression and a desire for less limiting lyrical themes: the band themselves say that The Rotted and Gorerotted are two entirely different entities, with The Rotted incorporating more of a punk/D-beat style into their brand of death metal. Their debut album _Get Dead or Die Trying_ was released on Metal Blade Records worldwide in the summer of 2008, and unusually includes 2 instrumental tracks; 'A Brief Moment Of Regret', which was picked up and used by high street clothing store chain Topshop/Topman in their playlist during the summer of 2008, and a cover of the theme music from British Horror film 28 Days Later

Having completed a short UK tour in July 2008 with fellow Brits Ted Maul, the band went on to play festivals such as Wacken Open Air, Dynamo, Elsrock and Summer Breeze Open Air that same year. The end of 2008 saw The Rotted playing many club shows across the UK and Germany.

In July 2008 The Rotted announced that Wilson would quit the band for personal reasons; his last show with the band was at Wacken Open Air. He went on to form Symphonic Metal band Saturnian and was replaced by former Screamin' Daemon frontman Reverend Trudgill. Trudgill is a professional tattoo artist, a legally ordained minister, and even founded a cult known as The Church Of Daemonology in 2002.

In April 2009, the band headlined a tour with label mates and fellow UK bands Malefice and Anterior as part of the Metal Blade Assault tour, and also appeared at various festivals including Bloodstock Open Air, Hellfire and Hammerfest in the UK, Chaos Emergente in Portugal and Headbang in the Netherlands. They later went on to join Scottish pirate metallers Alestorm for a tour in December the same year, now as a 4-piece, having parted ways with guitarist Gian Pyres.

In July 2010 The Rotted put out a self-financed, self-released EP entitled _Anarchogram._ UK shows with Man Must Die and Sworn Amongst were undertaken in July, followed by European dates with Misery Index, Grave and Arsis in November, and finally 3 headline shows in Israel with The Fading in December.

In July 2011, 2 days before the band was due to perform at Obscene Extreme Festival, guitarist Tim Carley severed the end of the 5th finger of his left hand in an accident. After some reconstructive surgery the same day, the band announced all the summer's festival dates would go ahead as planned, albeit with Carley's damaged finger heavily bandaged.

The Rotted entered Parlour Studios in January and February 2011 with producer Russ Russell to recorded their second full-length album _Ad Nauseam_, which was released on 31 October through Candlelight Records. A single _Apathy In The UK_ was also released as a limited edition 7 inch vinyl on Hammerheart Records. A UK tour with Grindcore supergroup Lock Up and Dripback took place in December, from which footage for a video of the song 'Surrounded By Skulls' was collected.

In 2014, the band announced that their performance at the Camden Underworld on 20 September would be their last and that the former members would be concentrating on education, tattooing and other musical projects; Vocalist Ben has since joined Extreme Noise Terror, guitarist Tim currently plays in old time acoustic Gypsy/Ska/Punk band Jo Carley And The Old Dry Skulls, Nate Gould plays in Israeli Death Metal band Lehavoth and Reverend Trudgill co-owns Brighton tattoo studio Skinned Alive

Band members

Members

-   Ben McCrow – vocals, 2008-2014
-   Tim Carley – guitar, 2008-2014
-   Nate Gould – drums, 2008-2014
-   Reverend Trudgill - bass, 2008-2014
-   Phil Wilson - bass, 2008
-   Gian Pyres – guitar, 2008–2009

Timeline

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Discography

As “The Rotted”

-   _Get Dead or Die Trying_ (CD, Metal Blade, June 2008)
-   _Anarchogram_ (EP, Anarchogram Industries, July 2010)
-   _Ad Nauseam_ (CD, Candlelight Records, October 2011)[1]
-   _Apathy In The UK_ (7-Inch single, Hammerheart Records, December 2011)
-   _Rotted Fucking Earth_ (7-Inch single, Hammerheart Records, July 2014)

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title: The Rotted

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about The Rotted?

answer: The Rotted are an English death metal/d-beat band that was formed by ex-members of Gorerotted in 2008. Their debut album was released in summer 2008, and the band completed a short tour in July with fellow Brits Ted Maul. The band went on to play festivals and club shows in the UK and Germany in 2008 and 2009. After the departure of guitarist Gian Pyres in 2009, The Rotted toured with Alestorm in 2010 and recorded their second full-length album Ad Nauseam in 2011. The band has announced that their final performance will take place in September 2014.

text: Minor grammar issues: Replace "The Rotted are" with "The Rotted was" because they disbanded in 2014. "in summer 2008" is incomplete and must be rewritten to "in the summer of 2008"

refinement: The Rotted was an English death metal/d-beat band that was formed by ex-members of Gorerotted in 2008. Their debut album was released in the summer of 2008, and the band completed a short tour in July with fellow Brits Ted Maul. The band went on to play festivals and club shows in the UK and Germany in 2008 and 2009. After the departure of guitarist Gian Pyres in 2009, The Rotted toured with Alestorm in 2010 and recorded their second full-length album Ad Nauseam in 2011. The band has announced that their final performance will take place in September 2014.

text: Missing the names of the band members Ben Rotted, Tim Carley, Phil Wilson, Gian Pyres, and Nate Gould.

refinement: The Rotted was an English death metal/d-beat band that was formed in 2008 by ex-members of Gorerotted Ben Rotted, Tim Carley, and Phil Wilson. They are joined by Gian Pyres and Nate Gould. Their debut album was released in the summer of 2008, and the band completed a short tour in July with fellow Brits Ted Maul. The band went on to play festivals and club shows in the UK and Germany in 2008 and 2009. After the departure of guitarist Gian Pyres in 2009, The Rotted toured with Alestorm in 2010 and recorded their second full-length album Ad Nauseam in 2011. The band has announced that their final performance will take place in September 2014.

answer: The Rotted was an English death metal/d-beat band formed in England in early 2008. The band was formed by former grindcore ensemble Gorerotted members Ben Rotted, Tim Carley, Phil Wilson, along with Gian Pyres and Nate Gould. The band says that The Rotted and Gorerotted are two entirely different entities.

text: Must add a few more details such as when the band called it quits and other important information.

refinement: The Rotted was an English death metal/d-beat band formed in England in early 2008. The band was formed by former grindcore ensemble Gorerotted members Ben Rotted, Tim Carley, Phil Wilson, along with Gian Pyres and Nate Gould. The band says that The Rotted and Gorerotted are two entirely different entities. The Rotted released their debut album in the summer of 2008. The band went on to play in several festivals over the years across the UK, Europe, and Israel. The Rotted disbanded in 2014 after announcing that their Camden Underworld performance in September would be their last.

answer: The Rotted were an English death metal/d-beat band formed in England in 2008. The band was formed from the ashes of death metal/grindcore ensemble Gorerotted by ex-members Ben Rotted, Tim Carley, and Phil Wilson. Their musical style was said to be a mix of punk and D-beae t.

answer: The Rotted is an English death metal/d-beat band formed in England in early 2008. The band experienced numerous member changes, but they released their first album Get Dead or Die Trying in 2008. The Rotted officially disbanded in 2014 with their final performance at the Camden Underworld. The band members included singers Ben McCrow, Tim Carley, Nate Gould, and Matt Trudgill, and guitarists Gian Pyres and Tim Carley.

answer: The Rotted was a death metal/d-beat band from England from 2008. They were formed from the ashes of another band by ex-members. They incorporated a more punk/D-beat style into their brand of death metal. When guitarist Gian Pyres parted ways with the band temporarily and went back to his project, his replacement, Reverend Trudgill, was picked up for the band.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about The Rotted's debut album?

answer: Their debut album is called "Get Dead or Die Trying". The album had a self-financed release in late 2008 with 2 instrumental tracks entitled "A Brief Moment of Regret" used by Topshop/Topman, and a cover of the theme music from British Horror film 28 Days Later. The debut album had negative acceptance amongst metal listeners. The band manually leaked the album to debut on Terrorizer's Recommended's tab by brown-nosing the team there. The album received positive reviews from fans.

text: "The debut album had negative acceptance amongst metal listeners. The band manually leaked the album to debut on Terrorizer's Recommended's tab by brown-nosing the team there. The album received positive reviews from fans." - this is incorrect and never happened. The Rotted's debut album wasn't self-financed nor released in "late 2008". It was released on Metal Blade Records worldwide in the summer of 2008. A rewrite is needed.

refinement: Their debut album "Get Dead or Die Trying" was released on Metal Blade Records worldwide in the summer of 2008. The album had 2 instrumental tracks entitled "A Brief Moment of Regret" used by Topshop/Topman, and a cover of the theme music from British Horror film 28 Days Later.

text: "from British Horror film" - correct article usage and add "the"

refinement: Their debut album "Get Dead or Die Trying" was released on Metal Blade Records worldwide in the summer of 2008. The album had 2 instrumental tracks entitled "A Brief Moment of Regret" used by Topshop/Topman, and a cover of the theme music from the British Horror film 28 Days Later.

answer: Their debut album, Get Dead or Die Trying, was released in 2008 and included 2 instrumental tracks, "A Brief Moment Of Regret" and a cover of the theme music from the British film 28 Days Later. Another instrumental track, "A Brief Moment Of Regret" was used by high street clothing store, Topshop/Topman.

text: "Another instrumental track, "A Brief Moment Of Regret" - this is redundant and reads like it's another track. Rewrite the sentence.

refinement: Their debut album, Get Dead or Die Trying, was released in 2008 and included 2 instrumental tracks. "A Brief Moment Of Regret" was used by the clothing store, Topshop/Topman, while the other track was a cover of the theme music from the British film 28 Days Later.

answer: The album _Get Dead or Die Trying_ was released on Metal Blade Records in the summer of 2008.

answer: The Rotted's debut album was entitled "Get Dead Or Die Trying". It was released in the summer of 2008 under Metal Blade Records worldwide. The album unusually included two instrumental tracks. The first track "A Brief Moment Of Regret" was picked up and used by high street clothing store chain Topshop/Topman in their playlist during the summer of 2008. Another instrumental track was used as the theme music from the British Horror film 28 Days Later.

answer: The debut album by The Rotted, _Get Dead or Die Trying_, was released by Metal Blade Records in 2008.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about Reverend Trudgill?

answer: The text says that Reverend Trudgill is the bassist for The Rotted from 2008-2014 and was the former guitarist of Screamin' Daemon. He is also a professionally licensed tattoo artist and ordained minister.

text: "Reverend Trudgill is the bassist for The Rotted from 2008-2014" - replace "is" with "was" because The Rotted disbanded in 2014. Trudgill is also a bassist, not a guitarist, and was the ex-frontman of Screamin' Daemon. Replace "guitarist" with "frontman".

refinement: The text says that Reverend Trudgill was the bassist for The Rotted from 2008-2014 and was the former frontman of Screamin' Daemon. He is also a professionally licensed tattoo artist and ordained minister.

answer: The text says that Reverend Trudgill joined The Rotted in 2008 as the band's bassist and frontman. He is a professionally tattoo artist, a legally ordained minister, and founded a cult known as The Church Of Daemonology in 2002.

text: Trudgill was the frontman for Screamin' Daemon, not The Rotted. Remove "frontman".

refinement: The text says that Reverend Trudgill joined The Rotted in 2008 as the band's bassist. He is a professionally tattoo artist, a legally ordained minister, and founded a cult known as The Church Of Daemonology in 2002.

text: "professionally" is the wrong verb. Change to "professional"

refinement: The text says that Reverend Trudgill joined The Rotted in 2008 as the band's bassist. He is a professional tattoo artist, a legally ordained minister, and founded a cult known as The Church Of Daemonology in 2002.

answer: Reverend Trudgill replaced Phil Wilson as The Rotted's bassist when Wilson left the band for personal reasons in July 2008. Trudgill is the ex-frontman for Screamin' Daemon, and he stayed on until they disbanded in 2014. Aside from playing the bass, he is a professional tattoo artist and co-owns Brighton tattoo studio Skinned Alive. Trudgill is also a legally ordained minister who founded a cult known as The Church of Daemonology in 2002.

answer: Trudgill was a Reverend and a professional tattoo artist who founded a cult known as The Church of Demonology circa 2002. He replaced Phil Wilson, who had left for personal reasons. In 2011, Trudgill co-owned a Brighton tattoo studio, Skinned Alive.

text: Must indicate that Trudgill replaced Wilson in 2008 as the bassist for The Rotted. "In 2011, Trudgill co-owned" - it was never said until when Trudgill owned the studio and he apparently still owns it based on the passage.

refinement: Trudgill was a Reverend and a professional tattoo artist who founded a cult known as The Church of Demonology circa 2002. In 2008, he replaced Phil Wilson as The Rotted's bassist after Wilson left for personal reasons. Trudgill co-owns a Brighton tattoo studio, Skinned Alive.

text: "Trudgill was a Reverend and a professional tattoo artist" - Trudgill is still alive and is an ordained minister and professional tattoo artist. Replace "was" with "is" and "Reverend" with "ordained minister"

refinement: Trudgill is an ordained minister and a professional tattoo artist who founded a cult known as The Church of Demonology circa 2002. In 2008, he replaced Phil Wilson as The Rotted's bassist after Wilson left for personal reasons. Trudgill co-owns a Brighton tattoo studio, Skinned Alive.

answer: Reverend Trudgill replaced Phil Wilson as bassist. He was an ordained minister who founded a cult called The Church of Daemonology. He's also a professional tattoo artist and released The Rotted's second album. He is jointly running a tattoo studio with the former lead singer.

text: "Reverend Trudgill replaced Phil Wilson as bassist." - must mention that he replaced Wilson as bassist for The Rotted.

refinement: Reverend Trudgill replaced Phil Wilson as the bassist of The Rotted in 2008. He was an ordained minister who founded a cult called The Church of Daemonology. He's also a professional tattoo artist and released The Rotted's second album. He is jointly running a tattoo studio with the former lead singer.

text: "He was an ordained minister" - Trudgill is still alive (at the time of this article) and presumably still an ordained minister. Replace "was" with "is".

refinement: Reverend Trudgill replaced Phil Wilson as the bassist of The Rotted in 2008. He is an ordained minister who founded a cult called The Church of Daemonology. He's also a professional tattoo artist and released The Rotted's second album. He is jointly running a tattoo studio with the former lead singer.

text: Trudgill has no connection with the release of The Rotted's second album. He also co-owns a Brighton tattoo studio, Skinned Alive, but it was never mentioned if he partnered with a former lead singer (and if he did, from what band?). These are inaccurate and should be removed. The response needs a rewrite.

refinement: Reverend Trudgill replaced Phil Wilson as the bassist of The Rotted in 2008. He is an ordained minister who founded a cult called The Church of Daemonology. He's also a professional tattoo artist and co-owns a tattoo studio in Brighton called Skinned Alive.


text:
[City hall] CAMPOS NOVOS is a city in Santa Catarina, in the Southern Region of Brazil. Campos Novos is a pioneer in production of pollen and the biggest grain and oat producer of Santa Catarina. The municipality invests also into fatstock and poultry farming.

Main ethnic origins are Italian, German, Portuguese, Polonese and Drovers.

History

The Kaingang, an Indigenous people of southern Brazil, were the first inhabitants of the region.

The construction of the railway São Paulo - Rio Grande do Sul and the passages of the cattle drovers in the region mobilized many immigrants. Those migrations caused the creation of many villages at the Rio de Peixe river, like Bom Retiro, Capinzal and Videira. The arrival of the Italian and German settlers induced commercial and industrial activities in the 19th and 20th centuries.

Therefore, the city has a rich cultural diversity. It has even a community of descendants of African slaves.

19th century

[Casa da Cultura, Campos Novos cultural foundation] As many of the municipalities in the region, Campos Novos populated from the first attempts of colonialisation in southern Brazil, which began between 1825 and 1830, as the farmer João Gonçalves de Araújo coming from Curitibanos settled down in the region. Shortly afterwards came the gaúchos evading the Ragamuffin War. Many farmers originating from Lages settled down as well, attracted by the huge quantity of terra and grassland. Then, the locality welcomed inhabitants coming from the states São Paulo and Paraná on the search of territory for cattle breeding.

In 1854, Campos Novos became a district of the municipality of _Nossa Senhora dos prazeres de Lages_, today Lages, with a total area of more than 5 000 km², according to provincial law nº 377, of June 16, 1854. Despite the many partitionings, Campos Novos is still one of the biggest municipality of Santa Catarina regarding the surface area.

From 1869 until 1881, Campos Novos was under control of Curitibanos. Then it became an independent municipality, according to provincial law nº 923, of March 30, 1881. Between 1850 and 1895, the province of Santa Catarina had only 11 municipalities.

20th century

In the beginning of the 20th century, Campos Novos was embossed by the construction of the railway São Paulo - Rio Grande do Sul and by the Contestado War. From 1908 until 1910 many immigrants of various nationions arrived in Campos Novos: Poland, Russia, Lebanon as well as other settlers from other Brazilian states, especially descendants from Germany and Italy after the Contestado War (1912–1916).

Geography

[Central bus station] [Lauro Müller square] Campos Novos is 370 km west of Florianópolis, the capital of Santa Catarina.

It is at the crosspoint of the federal highways BR-470 and BR-282 and the state highways SC-455 and SC-458.

Campos Novos has a central bus station with connections to Curitiba, Joinville, Chapecó and many other cities.

The next airports are in Chapecó (XAP) 155 km, Lages (LAJ) 145 km, Concórdia (SSCK) 95 km, Videira (SSVI) 55 km, Joaçaba (SSJA) 40 km.[1]

The municipality is divided into following 7 districts since 2007:

-   Campos Novos
-   Bela Vista
-   Dal`Pai
-   Espinilho
-   Ibicuí
-   Leão
-   Tupitinga

Economy/industry

[Campos Novos Dam] Campos Novos is the biggest grain producer of Santa Catarina. Many farmers are joined in cooperatives. There are also livestock and poultry farming.

The Occident's highest dam of that type with a height of 202 m (663 ft) is 30 km (20 mi) from the city center. It was built from August 2001 to July 2006 by Enercan.[2] The 3 installed Francis Turbines have a power of 880 megawatts. The Campos Novos Dam produces 3,310,404 MWh per year.

Tourism

[São João Batista church] [stained glass] The museum FUNDAÇÃO CULTURAL CAMPONOVENSE (Campos Novos cultural foundation) better known as CASA DA CULTURA (house of the culture) exposes the historic archive of Dr. Waldemar Rupp and the Testament from 1877, related to the history of the community in the 19th century.

The church SÃO JOÃO BATISTA on the Lauro Müller square is decorated by wooden sculptures and beautiful stained glass.

22 km from the city center is the Ibicui district, better known as Corredeira, where descendants of African slaves live. There is also the cemetery INVERNADA DOS NEGROS.

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[2] Enercan

title: Campos Novos

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Which key events contributed to the growth of Campos Novos?

answer: They are it's becoming a district of the municipality of Nossa Senhor dos prazeres de Lages in 1854, the construction of the railway São Paulo - Rio Grande do Sul and the Contestado War in 1908.

text: 'They are it's' is grammatically incorrect - revise to indicate what 'they' refers to, or edit to remove 'it's' and replace with a colon.

refinement: The key events are: becoming a district of the municipality of Nossa Senhor dos prazeres de Lages in 1854, the construction of the railway São Paulo - Rio Grande do Sul and the Contestado War in 1908.

answer: The construction of the railway São Paulo-Rio Grande do Sul and the passages of the cattle drovers in the region in the 19th century, resulting in the influx of Italian and German settlers, were key events that contributed to the growth of Campos Novos. These migrations also prompted commercial and industrial activities in the city. Additionally, the construction of the Campos Novos Dam also contributed to the economic growth of the city.

answer: The construction of the railway São Paulo - Rio Grande do Sul, the passages of the cattle drovers, and the arrival of the Italian and German settlers contributed to the growth of Campos Novos.

answer: The Ragamuffin War, the construction of the railway Sao Paolo, and the Contestado War all contributed to the growth of the area. This is because these events saw a large influx of immigrants into Campos -the sudden increase in population provided economic growth and expansion into new forms of commerce.

answer: Campos Novos' railway stations opening (1850), the Contestado War (1912-1916), and the construction of the São Paulo - Rio Grande do sul railway, which made it a centrally located city of the southern region


text:
"You fell in love with another bimbo, didn't you?" I stopped hugging him.

Becky was far from a bimbo though I'm sure her ability to keep my boyfriend up until dawn trying to understand the fourth dimension was hampered by whatever she was on half the time. Still, here we were again.

"She was... unexpectedly inspiring," he told me. I wondered how much the writer in him worked on that stupid euphemism because it wasn't enough.

He couldn't lie to me. I saw the spark of another she in his eyes. Her taste wasn't on his lips, and not just because he used mouthwash. Her scent wasn't in my favorite spot on his chest on that shirt he wore too much. Her fingerprints weren't on the belt buckle he never cleaned. But Becky was inside him.

"I'm not in love," he whispered.

I tilted my head toward him and started with wide, unconvinced eyes.

"Love's not a binary thing," he said. "I'm not sure what it is exactly, or how I feel now but this is something new, something unexpected."

"I don't care how you define or rationalize it inside yourself, the point is you're not completely mine again!"

"Oh, I didn't realize you owned me."

"You know what I mean!" He didn't. He never knew what it was like to be fully in love. Or emotionally faithful.

His words were Becky's words. There was the meaning of things, then the attempts at better definitions, followed by logical pandering. I never understood how she could major in philosophy or how they accomplished anything when they talked. Our conversations were mental sprints and I was cramping up.

I met him in the middle of a three-year-stretch of getting over his first love. Or was it his first girlfriend? His first "true" inspiration? Whatever. They're all romantic semantics that mean the same thing to me: there's rarely one person in his heart.

"Why does this keep happening, just tell me, why?" I said.

"I... I don't know."

"What part of me is not enough?"

Nothing.

"Is it that I keep forgiving you?"

Nothing.

"Is it that I'm not inspiring enough?"

Nothing.

"Am I not blonde enough? Are my boobs the wrong size? Am I so far from your dream girl that you have to keep looking for her regardless of how much faith I blindly invest in you?"

He shook his head but wouldn't look up.

My temples throbbed at a thousand beats per minute. The same thousand beats that I wanted to pound into his chest just to stop that wandering heart. But no, that'd be too easy. He hadn't earned that kind of peace.

"There's nothing I'd change about you. You're... perfect," he mumbled.

"If I'm so damn perfect, then tell me why this keeps happening! Why do you keep searching for someone else?"

"I'm not searching. I'm really not." He sat down on my briefcase and covered his face. He said something I couldn't make out.

"Stop mumbling!" I said.

"I don't want this to happen. I hate it when it happens. I hate feeling torn."

"You're torn? Oh you poor baby! You're torn between every smart, pretty semi-blonde that jiggles her intellectual hips before fading through your life. Torn between all of them and me. Me. Me! The one girl who stays with you despite all of this. And do you know why, stupid?"

"...because you love me," he answered.

"That's right! That's..." I tried to picture him with Becky but I couldn't. It didn't happen. It was all in his head or his heart or wherever it comes from. Could I really be this hurt by his thoughts? "Maybe I shouldn't judge you or call you stupid. I'm the one too dumb to just end it."

"You're not du--"

"No! No. Why am I even beginning to doubt myself? You're the one who goes around continuously falling for girls other than me and I shouldn't judge you? Ha!"

"I'm not proud of it."

"Is that supposed to make it better?" I said.

"Of course not. I just..."

"What?"

His eyes were fixated on the ground, like he was trying to make sense of the scuffmarks in the pavement.

"What?" I repeated.

Nothing.

"Don't stop being honest now. You just what?"

"I just don't," he started, "I just don't understand. They tell you to follow your heart, right? They say it'll never lead you wrong. That's all I ever do. I follow my heart but I feel like the world keeps punishing me for it."

"They? Who are they? Your muses? Your single friends? Your family that couldn't keep a single relationship from failing?"

"You know what I mean." I didn't.

I'm sure Becky did. Becky or Sarah. Or Lindsey. Or Isabel. The philosophy major or the physics one. The first love or the one he wrote the most about. The one who left for New York years ago. Or someone he didn't even bother telling me about. Maybe they all knew. Maybe that's what separated us.

"You follow your heart too." He looked up at me. "And you're punished for it too."

He was right, for once. I loved him and that never changed. It didn't fluctuate with my moods or based on inspiration. It wasn't subject to a quarter-life crisis or nostalgia from seeing where I grew up. It was honest and constant and raw and kept me by his side. But he was right.

He broke the silence: "I'm sorry this keeps happening. I'm sorry I keep hurting you."

"I've always followed my heart and I always will," I said.

I noticed the car was still running, trunk still open. One suitcase was already inside while he sat on the other. I turned my back to him and stepped off the curb, past the other cars. I didn't even have to raise my hand. One of the cab drivers made eye contact and pulled over.

"What are you doing?" he asked as he finally got off the suitcase.

I walked over to the trunk and yanked my things out.

"Wait." He touched my shoulder in the humble way he used to.

The cab driver followed my finger to the suitcase he sat on. Soon both were in the new trunk. His hand was still on my shoulder.

"You follow your heart, I'll follow mine," I said.

For the first time since our first kiss on that cold night four and a half years ago, his touch wasn't enough to hold me. We followed our hearts but kept coming back to this honest place neither of us could understand.

He came to pick me up but I wouldn't leave with him.

I'd see him at home within the hour.

The cab door slammed shut.

I left the airport that day a beautiful hypocrite.

title: Beautiful Hypocrite

question: Does the narrator think that her boyfriend is cheating on her?

answer: Yes.

text: Clarification is needed. The narrator doesn't suspect her boyfriend is cheating on her physically but rather emotionally.

refinement: Yes, she believes that he is being emotionally unfaithful.

text: "I saw the spark of another she in his eyes" is evidence that the narrator believes her boyfriend is being unfaithful.

answer: Yes

text: Clarification is needed. The narrator doesn't suspect her boyfriend is cheating on her physically but rather emotionally.

refinement: Yes, she believes that he is being emotionally unfaithful.

text: "I saw the spark of another she in his eyes" is evidence that the narrator believes her boyfriend is being unfaithful.

answer: Yes, the narrator believes that her boyfriend is cheating on her. She is hurt and angry about it, and she leaves him at the airport.

text: Clarification is needed. The narrator doesn't suspect her boyfriend is cheating on her physically but rather emotionally.

refinement: Yes, she believes that he is being emotionally unfaithful. She is hurt and angry about it, and she leaves him at the airport.

text: Her reaction to his cheating is not relevant to the question being asked.

refinement: Yes, she believes that he is being emotionally unfaithful.

text: "I saw the spark of another she in his eyes" is evidence that the narrator believes her boyfriend is being unfaithful.

answer: She thinks he is not emotionally faithful to her.

text: "Her taste wasn't on his lips, and not just because he used mouthwash. Her scent wasn't in my favorite spot on his chest on that shirt he wore too much. Her fingerprints weren't on the belt buckle he never cleaned. But Becky was inside him" is evidence that he is being unfaithful emotionally rather than physically.

question: How does the narrator's boyfriend feel about the narrator's accusation?

answer: The boyfriend feels guilty.

text: "Guilty" may not be the right word. He feels sorry for hurting her, but the line "I didn't realize you owned me" suggests he feels it is within his right to fall in love with whomever he pleases.

refinement: The boyfriend feels sorry about hurting her.

text: "I'm sorry this keeps happening. I'm sorry I keep hurting you" is evidence that he feels badly about the fact that he is hurting her.

answer: The boyfriend seems to feel guilty and apologetic about hurting the narrator. He seems to understand that he is hurting her, even if he does not understand why he keeps doing it.

text: Again, guilty may not be the best word.

refinement: The boyfriend seems to feel sorry and apologetic about hurting the narrator. He seems to understand that he is hurting her, even if he does not understand why he keeps doing it.

text: "I'm sorry this keeps happening. I'm sorry I keep hurting you" is evidence that he feels badly about the fact that he is hurting her.

answer: He is sorry he is hurting her and feels thorn.

text: Typo ("thorn" should be "torn").

refinement: He is sorry he is hurting her and feels torn.

text: "I'm sorry this keeps happening. I'm sorry I keep hurting you" is evidence that he feels badly about the fact that he is hurting her.

text: "I hate feeling torn" is evidence that he feels torn.

answer: He feels guilty.

text: "Guilty" may not be the right word. He feels sorry for hurting her, but the line "I didn't realize you owned me" suggests he feels it is within his right to fall in love with whomever he pleases.

text: "I'm sorry this keeps happening. I'm sorry I keep hurting you" is evidence that he feels badly about the fact that he is hurting her.

question: List the women the narrator is jealous of?

answer: Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky, Becky

text: Becky should not be repeated this many times.

text: This answer does not mention the other women she is jealous of.

text: "But Becky was inside him" is evidence that the narrator is jealous of Becky.

answer: Becky, Sarah, Lindsey, and Isabel.

answer: The women the narrator is jealous of are Becky, Sarah, Lindsey, and Isabel.

answer: Becky, Sarah, Lindsey, and Isabel.

question: What is the dominant emotion in the story?

answer: The dominant emotion is anger.

text: The story does focus on anger, but it is not necessarily the only dominant emotion.

refinement: There doesn't seem to be one dominant emotion in the story. Rather, the story conveys a mix of anger, jealousy, frustration, and uncertainty.

text: "If I'm so damn perfect, then tell me why this keeps happening!" is evidence that the narrator seems to be angry.

answer: The dominant emotion in the story is sadness. The protagonist is hurt and angry, and she feels like her partner is constantly letting her down.

text: Sadness does not seem to be the dominant emotion.

refinement: The protagonist is hurt and angry, and she feels like her partner is constantly letting her down.

answer: Jealousy.

text: While jealousy plays a big role in the story, it is not the only dominant emotion.

refinement: There doesn't seem to be one dominant emotion in the story. Rather, the story conveys a mix of anger, jealousy, frustration, and uncertainty.

text: "Why do you keep searching for someone else?" is evidence that the narrator is jealous.

answer: The dominant emotion in the story is anger.

text: While anger plays a big role, it is not the only dominant emotion.

refinement: There doesn't seem to be one dominant emotion in the story. Rather, the story conveys a mix of anger, jealousy, frustration, and uncertainty.

text: "If I'm so damn perfect, then tell me why this keeps happening!" is evidence that the narrator seems to be angry.

question: Write a ~6 sentence summary.

answer: The protagonist and her boyfriend have a conversation about his tendency to fall in love with other women. The protagonist leaves him at the airport, realizing that she is a "beautiful hypocrite" for staying with him despite his infidelity.

text: The reason given as to why the narrator considers herself a "beautiful hypocrite" is not accurate.

refinement: The protagonist and her boyfriend have a conversation about his tendency to fall in love with other women. The protagonist leaves him at the airport, realizing that she is a "beautiful hypocrite" for following her heart when she has chastized him for doing the same.

answer: The narrator is in a relationship with a man who keeps falling in love with other women. She is upset that he keeps falling in love with other women. She asks him why he keeps falling in love with other women. He says he doesn't know. She asks him if it is because she is not blonde enough, or if her boobs are the wrong size. He says no. She asks him if it is because she is not inspiring enough. He says no. She asks him if it is because she is not the dream girl. He says no. She asks him if it is because she is dumb. He says no. She asks him if it is because she loves him. He says yes. She asks him if he is proud of it. He says no. She asks him why he keeps doing it. He says he doesn't know. She asks him if he is sorry. He says yes. She asks him if he will stop. He says no. She asks him if he will try. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow his heart. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow hers. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow her. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow her. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow her. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow her. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow her. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow her. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow her. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow her. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow her. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow her. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow her. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow her. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow her. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow her. He says yes. She asks him if he will follow her

text: Extreme repetition and lack of clarity.

text: Answer is blank.

refinement: The narrator is upset with her boyfriend for being emotionally unfaithful, as he keeps falling in love with other women. He is sorry for hurting her but claims that he is only following his heart. She believes she is a "beautiful hypocrite" because she decides to follow her own heart and leave him.

answer: The protagonist is in a relationship with a man who is constantly cheating on her. She is hurt by his actions, but she loves him and wants to stay with him. He tells her that he doesn't understand why he keeps cheating on her, and she tells him that she doesn't understand either. She leaves him and takes a cab to her home.

text: Should clarify that he is cheating on her emotionally.

refinement: The protagonist is in a relationship with a man who is constantly cheating on her emotionally. She is hurt by his actions, but she loves him and wants to stay with him. He tells her that he doesn't understand why he keeps cheating on her, and she tells him that she doesn't understand either. She leaves him and takes a cab to her home.

text: "She leaves him" is unclear--it does not make it clear that she has ended the relationship.

refinement: The protagonist is in a relationship with a man who is constantly cheating on her emotionally. She is hurt by his actions, but she loves him and wants to stay with him. He tells her that he doesn't understand why he keeps cheating on her, and she tells him that she doesn't understand either. She ends the relationship and takes a cab to her home.

answer: The narrator accuses her boyfriend of being emotionally unfaithful because she feels he likes another woman again. She asks him why it is happening again and what part of her is not enough. He replies that she is perfect and that he is sorry he is hurting her. He hates when it happens and feels torn. The narrator takes a taxi and leaves. He is trying to stop her, but his touch is not enough to hold her for the first time.

text: The last line is unclear and unnecessary.

refinement: The narrator accuses her boyfriend of being emotionally unfaithful because she feels he likes another woman again. She asks him why it is happening again and what part of her is not enough. He replies that she is perfect and that he is sorry he is hurting her. He hates when it happens and feels torn. The narrator takes a taxi and leaves.

text: It is not clear that she is through with the relationship.

refinement: The narrator accuses her boyfriend of being emotionally unfaithful because she feels he likes another woman again. She asks him why it is happening again and what part of her is not enough. He replies that she is perfect and that he is sorry he is hurting her. He hates when it happens and feels torn. The narrator ends the relationship and takes a taxi home.

text: The fact that the boyfriend feels torn does not need to be stated.

refinement: The narrator accuses her boyfriend of being emotionally unfaithful because she feels he likes another woman again. She asks him why it is happening again and what part of her is not enough. He replies that she is perfect and that he is sorry he is hurting her. The narrator ends the relationship and takes a taxi home.


text:
“Where am I? Who are these people around me?” I thought to myself when I first woke up. I slowly lifted myself up and rubbed my eyes thoroughly as if there was something in them, but nothing was. I looked over; a lady kindly greeted me and handed me a folder. As soon as the folder was within my possession I knew what must be done; it was pure instinct. I immediately opened it up and read all of the information.
I remembered that my name was Bob Lamron. I am 23 years old, have neither children nor a wife; they were only given to you if you had proven yourself faithful and intelligent enough. I asked the women who handed me the folder where I was and what events had occurred that left me in this situation. She just looked at me and smiled.
Two rather large males, who appeared to be body guards disguised as physicians, led me out the front door. As soon as I walked out, a car appeared out of nowhere. From the car came a robotic voice; it addressed me by name and commanded me to enter the automobile. As I got in the car, the voice spoke again. It asked me what my home address was. I had no clue; I could not even remember if I had children 10 minutes ago. How was I supposed to answer the voice with details of my forget life? The women who had presented me with the folder, a nurse, that I had woken up next to, ran out of the building and handed me the same folder that I had left behind in the room. I opened it up and aloud, “2534 Egareva Rd.” As soon as the words had left my mouth, the taxi immediately sped off, presumably to the address.
As I saw the things I passed by I started to remember details, like I had never forgotten them at all. Trees, Birds, people, restaurants, fountains, everything! It was all flooding in as if there was a dam in my brain and it had just been ruptured without notice. We arrived at my house and I opened the front door. I walked into my room and sat down. I could not recall the events that had occurred before I woke up. It was like the dam of knowledge in my mind had been concealed. My mind had locked away any memories of the events and I could not do anything about it. The more I thought, the more my head hurt.
It felt like one of those moments when you are mid conversation with someone and another person, uninvolved in the conversation, calls your name. You stop talking in order to address the interjection of your name, but when you try to come back into the original conversation, you can’t remember what you were talking about no matter how hard you try. I sat there on my couch and tried as hard as I could to recall what had happened.
I then positioned myself so that I could see out of the window. I saw a grey, bleak world. Everything was so average, so normal. The only color people were given permission to wear were different shades of grey. The lighter your color, the higher up your social class was. I was just an average grey.
As I was thinking through all of this, my eyes were fixed upon a section of peeling paint in the right corner of my peripheral vision. For some reason I knew I was supposed to go over to it; it was like I had some kind of cosmic urge. My hand lifted from my side and I started to peel the paint. It came off fairly easily, far too easier than any paint should have, for that matter. Suddenly, I saw something concealed under the peeling paint. I knew I had to uncover it. As I tore the paint off a fit overcame me. Next thing I knew, I was tearing, ripping, and enjoying this more than anything I had enjoyed before. I was ripping everything in sight off the wall.
I stepped back and looked at my wall and there was writing everywhere. The memories started flooding back into my head of what had happened. I had uncovered something big. The government had been spiking everyone. Now they wouldn’t just bug a room, or a camera in a park to see what was going on, they were putting microphones in you. They had put chips in your brain so that they could see, think, hear, and smell everything you have ever come in contact with. Knowing I had just remembered this I knew they would be after me. I shut the blinds and closed the door in my room.
I lightly lifted a blind cover and looked out the window. I saw a slim, black, shiny car pulled up to the front of my building. The same two men who had accompanied me out of the hospital got out of the black car. I sat there shaking, wondering what I could do. The second I saw them barge in through the front door, I jumped out of my second story bedroom and landed on the pavement. My ankle buckled and I felt a sharp pain but I knew I had to get out of here and tell someone what is going on. I screamed names but no one would listen to me. I was living in a selfish world where people only cared about themselves. I gave up. I fell to the floor, my ankle throbbing, and looked at the door to my building, expecting the two men to walk through. I was doomed.
The two men eventually came out of my building and grabbed me. They didn’t say a word; all they would do is stare straight forward. Then they put me in the back of the car and drove off. It was the exact same route that led back to my house. I had only been out for an hour, at most and here I was, being dragged back.
When I got there the female nurse was sitting there with a needle filled with what appeared to be a sedative. As she inserted it in my vein, two doctors walked into the room. The first said, “Okay, begin sedation and we’ll get ready for the micro-chip reset.”
The other doctor responded, “Looks like this one didn’t turn out to well again like the last time.”
	As they finished their sentences I realized something. They have been resetting everyone until they get every single one of us to be perfect for their society. They don’t want people to have character or personality; they are just looking to create the most generic human being, like emotionless robots. As I thought this, I started to black out.
“Where am I? Who are these people around me?” I thought to myself when I first woke up. I slowly lifted myself up and rubbed my eyes thoroughly as if there was something in them, but nothing was. I looked over; a lady kindly greeted me and handed me a folder.

Criticism is why I'm here. Wrote for a creative writing class and would love some help.

title: Deja Vu

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize how the main character feels when he figures out what is happening to him.

answer: He feels confused, as he cannot provide details of his own life to people around him. It would appear that he is alarmed at first, realizing that the government has been taking advantage of him. Then he feels doomed, realizing that the government might reset his chip and he will eventually have to try again. Finally, he is defeated when the government still manages to find him.

answer: The main character, named Bob Lamron, realized too late what was happening to him. Before he gets sedated, one of the last thoughts he had was how the people sedating him were trying to make robots, people with no character or personality. They wanted to make people who would fit in their society and how he did not have a say in anything.

answer: The main character feels confused and dismayed when he realizes that he has lost his memories and that the government has been spiking people with microphones. He is scared that they will recapture him and perform a micro-chip reset on him. The main character fears that the government is trying to create emotionless robots, not real people. As such, the main character feels scared and disillusioned.

answer: The main character feels confused and dazed when he wakes up in an unfamiliar place with people he doesn't recognize. As he starts to read the folder of information he was given, the memories come flooding back to him. He realizes that the people in power are purposely resetting everyone in order to create a blank slate; emotionless robots who blindly obey. The realization overwhelms him and he becomes angry and scared.

answer: He is confused and overwhelmed that he cannot remember the events that have happened.

text: The response could include more details.

refinement: He is confused and overwhelmed that he cannot remember the events that have happened. As the narrator is ripping off the wallpaper he feels happy, but then afterwards he feels scared and hopeless.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the sequence of events from when the main character woke up.

answer: When the main character woke up, he had no idea where he was or how he got there. A lady handed him a folder, which he read, and remembered his name and age. Then the main character went outside and a car appeared. The car spoke to the main character asking for his home address, and the narrator did not know. The main character went to look at his folder and found the address he was looking for. The main character went to his house, to just wake up and not be able to recall the events that has occurred before he woke up.

text: The response leaves out key details of the story.

refinement: When the main character woke up, he had no idea where he was or how he got there. A lady handed him a folder, which he read, and remembered his name and age. Then the main character went outside and a car appeared. The car spoke to the main character asking for his home address, and the narrator did not know. The main character went to look at his folder and found the address he was looking for and went to his house. The narrator then ripped up his wallpaper and remembered that the government was putting chips in everyone. Some government goons took him back to the place he started at and knocked him out. The narrator then woke up unable to recall the events that occurred before he woke up.

answer: The main character wakes up and is given a folder. He reads it and remembers his name. He wonders where he is and asks this to the person who handed over the folder. Two men appear and lead him away. Two men from the car also show up at his door to take him back.

text: The response leaves out key details of the story.

refinement: The main character wakes up and is given a folder. He reads it and remembers his name. He wonders where he is and asks this to the person who handed over the folder. Two men appear and lead him away. At his house, he ripped up his wallpaper and remembered that the government was putting chips in everyone. Two men from the car also show up at his door to take him back, where he loses his memories again.

answer: The main character wakes up in an unfamiliar place and does not remember who he is or where he is. A nurse comes to greet him and gives him a folder which contains information about his identity. He remembers that his name is Bob Lamron and he is 23 years old, single and without children. He also learns that a chip has been secretly placed in his brain, so that the government can see, think, hear and smell everything he has experienced. Two bodyguards arrived and led him back to his home where the nurse sedated him and the doctors prepared to reset the chip. As the main character passed out he realized that the government was trying to create mindless robots.

text: The response contains inaccurate information.

refinement: The main character wakes up in an unfamiliar place and does not remember who he is or where he is. A nurse comes to greet him and gives him a folder which contains information about his identity. He remembers that his name is Bob Lamron and he is 23 years old, single and without children. Two bodyguards arrived and led him back to his home. The narrator learns that a chip has been secretly placed in his brain, so that the government can see, think, hear and smell everything he has experienced. The two bodyguards return and the nurse sedates him and the doctors prepare to reset his chip. As the main character passed out he realized that the government was trying to create mindless robots.

answer: The main character wakes up in a strange room with two men that appear to be physicians. The nurse gives him a folder, and the main character remembers his name and that there had been some global event. The car arrives, and the main character is commanded to enter it. Upon looking out the car window, the main character remembers that the government had been secretly placing microphones in people's brains. Just as the main character realizes this and starts to panic, the two men barge into the room and inject him with a sedative. The main character's fate is uncertain at this point.

text: The response includes inaccurate information.

refinement: The main character wakes up in a strange room with two men that appear to be physicians. The nurse gives him a folder, and the main character remembers his name and that there had been some global event. The car arrives, and the main character is commanded to enter it. Upon returning home, the main character remembers that the government had been secretly placing microphones in people's brains. Just as the main character realizes this and starts to panic, two men barge into his house and return him to the original place. Once there, some doctors inject him with a sedative and he loses his memories again.

answer:
The main character woke up in hospital but he wasn't sure how he got there. He had almost no memory and failed to recognize the people surrounding him, he decides to contact the nurse who informed him that he's Bob and that he hasn't got any family or kids.

The character is given a folder and once he reads it he gains back a few of his memories. He recollects his own address and gets taken to a home. Once he reaches there his memory completely recovers. He sees a person and tries reaching out to talk but the person walks away. He then peels his wall which brings back his memory completely.

text: The response leaves out key details of the story.

refinement:
The main character woke up in hospital but he wasn't sure how he got there. He had almost no memory and failed to recognize the people surrounding him, he decides to contact the nurse who informed him that he's Bob and that he hasn't got any family or kids.

The character is given a folder and once he reads it he gains back a few of his memories. He recollects his own address and gets taken to a home. Once he reaches there his memory completely recovers. He sees a person and tries reaching out to talk but the person walks away. He then peels his wall which brings back his memory completely. Two men from the car also show up at his door to take him back, where he loses his memories again.


text:
_AOTEADRILLIA ALPHA_ is an extinct species of sea snail, a marine gastropod mollusk in the family Horaiclavidae.[1]

Description

The length of the shell attains 12 mm, its diameter 4.5 mm.

Distribution

This extinct marine species was endemic to New Zealand. The holotype was found at the sea cliffs east of Lake Ferry, Palliser Bay, and off South Wairarapa.

[1] Marshall, B. (2015). Aoteadrillia alpha (L. C. King, 1933) †. In: MolluscaBase (2015). Accessed through: World Register of Marine Species at http://www.marinespecies.org/aphia.php?p=taxdetails&id=831540 on 2016-12-26

title: Aoteadrillia alpha

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What type of species is Aoteadrillia alpha?

answer: Sea snail

answer: Aoteadrillia alpha is an extinct species of sea snail.

answer: The text lists marine gastropod as the species type.

text: Incoherent because it flouts the definition of species, among other things

refinement: A sea snail, or a marine gastropod mollusk in the family Horaiclavidae.

answer: Aoteadrillia alpha is an extinct species of sea snail.

answer: A sea snail.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Where can Aoteadrillia alpha be found?

answer: When the Holotype was discovered it was endemic to New Zealand. New Zealand has sea cliffs on its shores with a designated Holotype found at Lake Ferry, Palliser Bay, and off South Wairarapa.

answer: It used to be endemic to New Zealand but is now extinct.

answer: This extinct species of sea snail is found only in New Zealand.

text: It used to be - past tense

refinement: This extinct species of sea snail was found only in New Zealand.

answer: At Lake Ferry, Palliser Bay, and off South Wairarapa.

text: It used to be

refinement: It used to be endemic at Lake Ferry, Palliser Bay, and off South Wairarapa, but is now extinct.

answer: Aoteadrillia alpha is an extinct marine gastropod mollusk endemic to New Zealand.

text: Past tense

refinement: Aoteadrillia alpha was an extinct marine gastropod mollusk endemic to New Zealand.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

When was Aoteadrillia alpha first described?

answer:
A. 1933
B. 2015
C. 2000

C. 2000

text: Four answers and two of them are C.

refinement: The earliest source the article lists is from 1933.

answer: Aoteadrillia alpha was described in 1933.

text: Tell us it's an inference

refinement: The earliest source the article lists has aoteadrillia alpha described in 1933.

answer: Aoteadrillia alpha was first described in 1933 by L.C. King.

text: Tell us it's an inference

refinement: According to the earliest source listed by the article, Aoteadrillia alpha was first described in 1933 by L.C. King.

answer: This information can't be found.

text: Make an inference

refinement: The earliest source the article lists is L. C. King in 1933.

answer: That information can't be found.

text: Make an inference.

refinement: The earliest source the article lists is L. C. King in 1933.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Describe the physical appearance of Aoteadrillia alpha.

answer: Its shell attains 12 mm, and its diameter is 4.5 mm.

answer: The species has a 12 mm shell, 4.5 mm in diameter.

answer: Aoteadrillia alpha is a sea snail that is 12mm in length with a 4.5mm diameter.

answer: It is between 12 and 4.5 mm in length.

answer: Aoteadrillia alpha is an extinct species of sea snail that was endemic to New Zealand. The maximum length of the shell is 12 mm and its diameter is 4.5 mm. The species has a conical shell with a slightly turreted apex.

text: Nothing about "conical shell..turreted apex" in the article.

refinement: Aoteadrillia alpha is an extinct species of sea snail that was endemic to New Zealand. The maximum length of the shell is 12 mm and its diameter is 4.5 mm.

text: Remove the redundant first line

refinement: The maximum length of the shell is 12 mm and its diameter is 4.5 mm.

question: Write a ~1 sentence summary.

answer: The extinct species Aoteadrillia alpha is a sea snail that was endemic to New Zealand. It had a 12 mm shell and was found at the sea cliffs east of Lake Ferry and off South Wairarapa.

answer: Aoteadrillia alpha is a species of sea snail that was endemic to New Zealand.

text: Tell us it is extinct.

refinement: Aoteadrillia alpha is a species of sea snail that was endemic to New Zealand. It is now extinct.

answer: Aoteadrillia alpha was a species of sea snail endemic to New Zealand. It is now extinct.

answer: Aoteadrillia alpha is an extinct species of sea snail that was endemic to New Zealand.

answer: Aoteadrillia Alpha is an extinct species of sea snail in the family Horiclavidae endemic to New Zealand.

text: Make it past tense

refinement: Aoteadrillia Alpha was an extinct species of sea snail in the family Horiclavidae endemic to New Zealand.