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California could soon end money bail, but some of the criminal justice groups who worked toward that goal aren’t celebrating.

A closely-watched bill to overhaul the state’s bail system advanced out of a key fiscal committee on Thursday with broad changes that would virtually eliminate the payment of money as a condition for release from jail.

That should have been a roaring victory for legislators and supporters who have long decried a system that they say unfairly punishes the poor. But the amendments also hand over more control to local courts and probation offices to decide who should remain incarcerated, a move former sponsors of the legislation contend could lead to indefinite detention.

State Sen. Bob Hertzberg (D-Van Nuys), co-author of Senate Bill 10, hailed the bill at a press conference on Thursday, calling it a success years in the making. He pointed to support from Gov. Jerry Brown, state Supreme Court Chief Justice Tani Cantil-Sakauye and Democratic front-runner for governor Gavin Newsom, the state’s lieutenant governor.

“I have worked on a lot of issues over the decades and I don’t remember one taking more time than this,” he said. “It has been really challenging making this fundamental sea change in the criminal justice system in California.”

Hertzberg later pushed back against criticism of the bill, saying it would dramatically transform a pretrial system that hurts poor defendants.

“We have a form of pretrial detention now, it is called bail,” Hertzberg said. “And guess what pretrial detention is? If you don’t have any money, you don’t get out.”

Some bail reform advocates have continued to support the bill, hoping to play a major role in implementation.

“The momentum behind SB 10 is strong, and we can’t miss the chance to move justice forward this year while continuing to press for further reforms,” said Laphonza Butler, president of the Service Employees International Union Local 2015.

But some sponsors dropped their support amid negotiations in recent weeks, and others are working to the kill the legislation. The American Civil Liberties Union, which has been working on the issue for years, moved on its position to neutral on Thursday.

The new version of the bill would “eliminate the exploitative and abusive commercial bailindustry that preys on low-income people, including a disproportionate number of black and brown people,” said Natasha Minsker, director for the ACLU of California Center for Advocacy and Policy. “On the other hand, SB 10 needs to go further to be the model for pretrial justice and racial equity that we are working towards.”

John Raphling, a senior researcher with Human Rights Watch, said the reason organizations were opposing SB 10 is that “it replaces money bail with a system that is likely to incarcerate more people and uses racially biased risk assessments and gives judges nearly unlimited discretion to lock people up.”

Meanwhile, bail agents and lobbyists are gearing up to launch massive opposition of their own, saying the revised changes would decimate the industry.

Hertzberg and Assemblyman Rob Bonta (D-Oakland) combined efforts in late 2016 to unveil a pair of identical bills that would eliminate the use of bail fee systems and require counties to establish their own pretrial services agencies. Those agencies were to develop a “risk-assessment tool,” a type of analysis to evaluate people booked into jail to determine whether and under what conditions they should be released.

Only Hertzberg’s bill has made it through the legislative process. Under the new version of his bill, pretrial services agencies would be overseen by county probation departments. Only people charged with certain low-level, nonviolent misdemeanors would be eligible for automatic release within 12 hours of being booked into jail, a list of charges that can be further narrowed by county.

All other people arrested would have to undergo risk analysis, which would sort offenders based on criminal history and other criteria into low-, medium- or high-risk categories. Courts would be required to release low-level defendants without assigning bail, pending a hearing. Pretrial-services offices would decide whether to hold or release medium-risk offenders.

Judges would have greater discretion over all prisoners in a practice known as “preventive detention,” allowing them to decide which people are a danger to the community and should be held without the possibility of release.

If a judge chooses to impose pretrial supervision requirements, such as ankle monitors, the Hertzberg bill would require they be covered free of charge to defendants.

On Thursday, Bonta said the new system would protect the poor and the public.

“It will replace a flawed, unsafe, money-based system with a fairer, safer system,” he said.

But the proposal is not yet in the clear, and it carries a hefty cost for counties.

Assemblyman Jim Cooper (D-Elk Grove) opposed a budget trailer bill in a hearing Tuesday that included $15 million for bail reform, noting that there is no guarantee the legislation would pass, and saying it was “putting the cart before the horse.”

“This is B.S, flat out B.S. Why this is in here?” he said.

Gina Clayton, founder and director of the Essie Justice Center, which provides leadership training and services to women with incarcerated loved ones, argued that Hertzberg’s bill would inflate budgets for law enforcement, probation and corrections.

“If the ‘War on Drugs’ has taught us anything at all, it is that we need more access to services,” Clayton said. “This is another bill that again makes a lot of the same mistakes.”

_Times reporter Patrick McGreevy contributed to this report._

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question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the revised bill do?

answer: Slashes the reliance on commercial bail bondsmen and in direct control of judges instead of the county's district attorney.

text: The answer is somewhat nonsensical and confusing.

text: There's no answer.

refinement: It eliminates the payment of money for release from jail during the pretrial period. It gives the decision of forced pretrial detention to probation offices and judges for the most part.

answer: The revised bill would eliminate the use of money bail to release defendants awaiting trial and would place greater decision-making power on local courts and probation offices. The bill would also require that any restrictions on released prisoners be covered free of charge to defendants.

text: No bail payment: "broad changes that would virtually eliminate the payment of money as a condition for release from jail."

text: More power to judges and probation offices: "But the amendments also hand over more control to local courts and probation offices to decide who should remain incarcerated"

text: Free of charge restrictions: "If a judge chooses to impose pretrial supervision requirements, such as ankle monitors, the Hertzberg bill would require they be covered free of charge to defendants."

answer: The revised bill pretrial service agencies would be overseen by county probation departments. Only people charged with certain low-level, nonviolent misdemeanors would be eligible for automatic release within 12 hours of being booked into jail.

text: The answer should mention that the new bill proposes that pretrial restrictions aren't implemented at the expense of the defendant.

refinement: The revised bill pretrial service agencies would be overseen by county probation departments. Only people charged with certain low-level, nonviolent misdemeanors would be eligible for automatic release within 12 hours of being booked into jail. The new bill also proposes that pretrial supervision, such as ankle monitors, are supplied without cost to the defendants.

text: "Only Hertzberg’s bill has made it through the legislative process. Under the new version of his bill, pretrial services agencies would be overseen by county probation departments. Only people charged with certain low-level, nonviolent misdemeanors would be eligible for automatic release within 12 hours of being booked into jail"

answer: The revised bill would eliminate the use of money bail as a condition for release from jail. The bill would make all those arrested undergo a risk analysis that determines whether and under what conditions they should be released. Judges would have greater discretion in determining who should be detained. The bill would also require bail-related fees to be free for defendants.

text: The answer should mention the automatic release condition.

refinement: The revised bill would eliminate the use of money bail as a condition for release from jail. The bill would make all those arrested undergo a risk analysis that determines whether and under what conditions they should be released, except for the perpetrators of some crimes seen as very low risk. Judges would have greater discretion in determining who should be detained. The bill would also require bail-related fees to be free for defendants.

text: No bail money: "broad changes that would virtually eliminate the payment of money as a condition for release from jail."

text: Risk assessments: "All other people arrested would have to undergo risk analysis, which would sort offenders based on criminal history and other criteria into low-, medium- or high-risk categories."

text: More discretion to judges: "Judges would have greater discretion over all prisoners"

answer: The revised bill will eliminate money bail and allow for a wider discretion in who to incarcerate.

text: The discretion is given to judges.

refinement: The revised bill will eliminate money bail and give judges wider discretion in who to incarcerate.

text: There are other parts to the bill. The answer should mention them.

refinement: The revised bill will eliminate money bail and give judges wider discretion in who to incarcerate. Apart from a list of crimes seen as very low risk, the perpetrators of other crimes will undergo a risk assessment. Those seen as medium risk can be detained by judges if they chose to do so.

text: No bail money: "broad changes that would virtually eliminate the payment of money as a condition for release from jail."

text: More discretion to judges: "Judges would have greater discretion over all prisoners"

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who authored Senate Bill 10?

answer: State Sen. Bob Hertzberg (D-Van Nuys) wrote the bill.

text: The answer should mention that Sen. Hertzberg is a co-author, and the other writers aren't mentioned.

refinement: State Sen. Bob Hertzberg (D-Van Nuys) co-wrote the bill. Other writers aren't mentioned.

text: "State Sen. Bob Hertzberg (D-Van Nuys), co-author of Senate Bill 10"

answer: Senator Bob Hertzberg wrote Senate Bill 10.

text: The answer should mention that Sen. Hertzberg is a co-author, and the other writers aren't mentioned.

refinement: Senator Bob Hertzberg co-wrote Senate Bill 10. Other writers aren't mentioned.

text: "State Sen. Bob Hertzberg (D-Van Nuys), co-author of Senate Bill 10"

answer: State Sen. Bob Hertzberg authored Senate Bill 10.

text: The answer should mention that Sen. Hertzberg is a co-author, and the other writers aren't mentioned.

refinement: State Sen. Bob Hertzberg authored Senate Bill 10. Other authors aren't mentioned.

text: "State Sen. Bob Hertzberg (D-Van Nuys), co-author of Senate Bill 10"

answer: The Senate Bill 10 is co-authored by State Sen. Bob Hertzberg (D-Van Nuys)

text: The answer should mention that the other authors of the bill aren't mentioned in the article.

refinement: The Senate Bill 10 is co-authored by State Sen. Bob Hertzberg (D-Van Nuys). Other authors aren't mentioned.

text: "State Sen. Bob Hertzberg (D-Van Nuys), co-author of Senate Bill 10"

answer: State Senator and Assemblyman Bob Hertzberg

text: Hertzberg is not an Assemblyman.

text: The answer should mention that Sen. Hertzberg co-wrote the bill, and the other writers aren't mentioned in the article.

refinement: State Senator Bob Hertzberg co-wrote the bill. Other authors aren't mentioned.

text: "State Sen. Bob Hertzberg (D-Van Nuys), co-author of Senate Bill 10"

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why are organizations opposing SB 10?

answer: Organizations are opposing the bill saying that it replaces money bail with a system that will likely incarcerate more people and use racially biased risk assessments and give the judges unlimited discretion on who to lock up.

text: While the given answer is mostly accurate, the answer should point out that the perspective belongs to John Raphling, a senior researcher with Human Rights Watch.

refinement: John Raphling, a senior researcher with Human Rights Watch, says that it replaces money bail with a system that will likely incarcerate more people and use racially biased risk assessments and give the judges unlimited discretion on who to lock up.

text: "John Raphling, a senior researcher with Human Rights Watch, said the reason organizations were opposing SB 10 is that 'it replaces money bail with a system that is likely to incarcerate more people and uses racially biased risk assessments and gives judges nearly unlimited discretion to lock people up.'"

answer: They believe it replaces money bail with a system that may incarcerate more and many believe it may result in indefinite detention.

text: "John Raphling, a senior researcher with Human Rights Watch, said the reason organizations were opposing SB 10 is that 'it replaces money bail with a system that is likely to incarcerate more people and uses racially biased risk assessments and gives judges nearly unlimited discretion to lock people up.'"

text: Indefinite detention: "But the amendments also hand over more control to local courts and probation offices to decide who should remain incarcerated, a move former sponsors of the legislation contend could lead to indefinite detention."

answer: Critics of SB 10 argue that it could result in increased incarceration. In addition, organizations and critics point to concerns that the bill gives judges too much discretion. They argue that this discretion could lead to indefinite detention.

text: Indefinite detention: "But the amendments also hand over more control to local courts and probation offices to decide who should remain incarcerated, a move former sponsors of the legislation contend could lead to indefinite detention."

text: Too much discretion and increased incarceration: "John Raphling, a senior researcher with Human Rights Watch, said the reason organizations were opposing SB 10 is that 'it replaces money bail with a system that is likely to incarcerate more people and uses racially biased risk assessments and gives judges nearly unlimited discretion to lock people up.'"

answer: Some organizations are opposing the bill because it replaces money bail with a system that is likely to incarcerate more people and uses racially biased risk assessments and gives judges nearly unlimited discretion to lock people up.

text: While the given answer is mostly accurate, the answer should point out that the perspective belongs to John Raphling, a senior researcher with Human Rights Watch.

refinement: John Raphling, a senior researcher with Human Rights Watch, says that it replaces money bail with a system that is likely to incarcerate more people and uses racially biased risk assessments and gives judges nearly unlimited discretion to lock people up.

text: Missing comma.

refinement: John Raphling, a senior researcher with Human Rights Watch, says that it replaces money bail with a system that is likely to incarcerate more people and uses racially biased risk assessments, and gives judges nearly unlimited discretion to lock people up.

text: "John Raphling, a senior researcher with Human Rights Watch, said the reason organizations were opposing SB 10 is that 'it replaces money bail with a system that is likely to incarcerate more people and uses racially biased risk assessments and gives judges nearly unlimited discretion to lock people up.'"

answer: Organizations are opposing SB 10 because this bill may lead to more incarceration and risk-based assessments which are racially biased. Additionally, the bail industry may be negatively impacted by this legislation and there is not a guarantee that it will pass.

text: May not pass: "Assemblyman Jim Cooper (D-Elk Grove) opposed a budget trailer bill in a hearing Tuesday that included $15 million for bail reform, noting that there is no guarantee the legislation would pass"

text: More incarceration and racial bias: "John Raphling, a senior researcher with Human Rights Watch, said the reason organizations were opposing SB 10 is that 'it replaces money bail with a system that is likely to incarcerate more people and uses racially biased risk assessments and gives judges nearly unlimited discretion to lock people up.'"

text: Affects bail industry: "Meanwhile, bail agents and lobbyists are gearing up to launch massive opposition of their own, saying the revised changes would decimate the industry."

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How would the changes affect lobbyists?

answer: According to the passage, some bail reform advocates are concerned that the new changes included in the bill could lead to indefinite detention. Some lobbyists oppose the bill, arguing that it would damage the bail industry. Therefore, the changes in the bill may negatively affect lobbyists.

text: The indefinite detention aspect doesn't concern the lobbyists.

refinement: Some lobbyists oppose the bill, arguing that it would damage the bail industry. Therefore, the changes in the bill may negatively affect lobbyists.

text: The article doesn't say that only "some" lobbyists oppose the bill.

refinement: Lobbyists oppose the bill, arguing that it would damage the bail industry. Therefore, the changes in the bill may negatively affect lobbyists.

text: Affects bail industry: "Meanwhile, bail agents and lobbyists are gearing up to launch massive opposition of their own, saying the revised changes would decimate the industry."

answer: They line up to oppose the bill.

text: The answer should mention that the changes are expected to decimate the bail industry.

refinement: They line up to oppose the bill since the changes are expected to decimate the bail industry.

text: Affects bail industry: "Meanwhile, bail agents and lobbyists are gearing up to launch massive opposition of their own, saying the revised changes would decimate the industry."

answer: The lobbyists would decimate their industry.

text: The changes would decimate the bail industry; not the lobbyists.

refinement: The changes would decimate the bail industry.

text: The answer should mention that the lobbyists oppose the bill as a consequence of their expectations.

refinement: The changes would decimate the bail industry. Thus, the lobbyists oppose the bill.

answer: Some lobbying groups which advocate for bail agents oppose the bill because of concerns that it would decimate the bail industry. Other advocacy groups, however, continue to support the bill even though they believe there are still flaws that need to be addressed.

text: The article doesn't mention lobbyists supporting the bill.

refinement: Some lobbying groups which advocate for bail agents oppose the bill because of concerns that it would decimate the bail industry.

text: The article doesn't say "some" lobbying groups oppose the bill.

refinement: The lobbying groups which advocate for bail agents oppose the bill because of concerns that it would decimate the bail industry.

text: Affects bail industry: "Meanwhile, bail agents and lobbyists are gearing up to launch massive opposition of their own, saying the revised changes would decimate the industry."

answer: All the lobbyists that are for commercial bail would be against the changes.

text: The answer should mention why the lobbyists would oppose the bill.

refinement: All the lobbyists that are for commercial bail would be against the changes because the new bill would decimate the bail industry.

text: Affects bail industry: "Meanwhile, bail agents and lobbyists are gearing up to launch massive opposition of their own, saying the revised changes would decimate the industry."

question: Write a ~7 sentence summary.

answer: California could soon end money bail, however some of the groups who advocated for its change have voiced their opposition to the revised bill. Critics are concerned that the bill now allows too much discretion for judges, meaning more people could be detained without the possibility of release. Meanwhile, proponents say the bill will protect the poor and the public while driving down costs for counties. The legislation is not yet in the clear.

text: The costs for detention are expected to be up, not down.

refinement: California could soon end money bail, however some of the groups who advocated for its change have voiced their opposition to the revised bill. Critics are concerned that the bill now allows too much discretion for judges, meaning more people could be detained without the possibility of release. Meanwhile, proponents say the bill will protect the poor and the public. The legislation is not yet in the clear.

text: Missing comma after "however"

refinement: California could soon end money bail, however, some of the groups who advocated for its change have voiced their opposition to the revised bill. Critics are concerned that the bill now allows too much discretion for judges, meaning more people could be detained without the possibility of release. Meanwhile, proponents say the bill will protect the poor and the public. The legislation is not yet in the clear.

text: End of bail in sight, supporters not excited: "California could soon end money bail, but some of the criminal justice groups who worked toward that goal aren’t celebrating."

text: More power to judges and probation offices: "But the amendments also hand over more control to local courts and probation offices to decide who should remain incarcerated"

text: Indefinite detention: "But the amendments also hand over more control to local courts and probation offices to decide who should remain incarcerated, a move former sponsors of the legislation contend could lead to indefinite detention."

text: Not in the clear: "But the proposal is not yet in the clear, and it carries a hefty cost for counties."

text: Protect the poor: "Hertzberg later pushed back against criticism of the bill, saying it would dramatically transform a pretrial system that hurts poor defendants."

answer: A bill that would overhaul California's bail system advanced Thursday, but critics say the changes could cause more people to be detained, and some bail reform advocates are not celebrating. Supporters of the bill say it would reduce the likelihood of pretrial detention for the poor, but others point to potential downsides and say the bill doesn't go far enough.

text: The answer should mention the downsides of the bill explicitly.

refinement: A bill that would overhaul California's bail system advanced Thursday, but critics say the changes could cause more people to be detained, and some bail reform advocates are not celebrating. Supporters of the bill say it would reduce the likelihood of pretrial detention for the poor, but others point to potential downsides and say the bill doesn't go far enough. The bill is expected to increase costs for the counties, and the new risk assessment tools are criticized for putting too much power into the hands of judges and probation offices with racially biased tools.

text: The answer can be broken down into shorter sentences to increase readability.

refinement: A bill that would overhaul California's bail system advanced Thursday. The critics say the changes could cause more people to be detained, and some bail reform advocates are not celebrating. Supporters of the bill say it would reduce the likelihood of pretrial detention for the poor, but others point to potential downsides and say the bill doesn't go far enough. The bill is expected to increase costs for the counties. The new risk assessment tools are criticized for putting too much power into the hands of judges and probation offices with racially biased tools.

text: More of the critiques can be mentioned.

refinement: A bill that would overhaul California's bail system advanced Thursday. The critics say the changes could cause more people to be detained, and some bail reform advocates are not celebrating. Supporters of the bill say it would reduce the likelihood of pretrial detention for the poor, but others point to potential downsides and say the bill doesn't go far enough. The bill is expected to increase costs for the counties. The new risk assessment tools are criticized for putting too much power into the hands of judges and probation offices with racially biased tools. Another big issue is the potential for indefinite detentions being possible under the new legislation.

text: The answer can use another sentence to mention that the bill isn't yet in the clear.

refinement: A bill that would overhaul California's bail system advanced Thursday. The critics say the changes could cause more people to be detained, and some bail reform advocates are not celebrating. Supporters of the bill say it would reduce the likelihood of pretrial detention for the poor, but others point to potential downsides and say the bill doesn't go far enough. The bill is expected to increase costs for the counties. The new risk assessment tools are criticized for putting too much power into the hands of judges and probation offices with racially biased tools. Another big issue is the potential for indefinite detentions being possible under the new legislation. The bill isn't yet in the clear.

text: End of bail in sight, supporters not excited: "California could soon end money bail, but some of the criminal justice groups who worked toward that goal aren’t celebrating."

text: Indefinite detention: "But the amendments also hand over more control to local courts and probation offices to decide who should remain incarcerated, a move former sponsors of the legislation contend could lead to indefinite detention."

text: Doesn't go far enough: "...said Natasha Minsker, director for the ACLU of California Center for Advocacy and Policy. 'On the other hand, SB 10 needs to go further to be the model for pretrial justice and racial equity that we are working towards.'"

answer:
California could soon end money bail. Supporters argue that such current practice unfairly punish the poor, but some criminal justice experts say the amended version of the bill will lead to more indefinite detention.

It was unveiled in 2016. The current version of the bill requires pretrial services agencies to be overseen by the county probation department. It also adds a risk assessment tool to differentiate between people to decide who should be detained or released.

Raphling and Clive say that the bill retains most of the flaws of the current system. Bail agents and lobbyists also stand against the bill, saying that it would decimate the industry.

There is also a debate about whether the allocated funds are enough to support the changes to the jail system.

text: Nobody says the new version retains the flaws of the current system.

refinement:
California could soon end money bail. Supporters argue that such current practice unfairly punish the poor, but some criminal justice experts say the amended version of the bill will lead to more indefinite detention.

It was unveiled in 2016. The current version of the bill requires pretrial services agencies to be overseen by the county probation department. It also adds a risk assessment tool to differentiate between people to decide who should be detained or released.

Bail agents and lobbyists also stand against the bill, saying that it would decimate the industry.

There is also a debate about whether the allocated funds are enough to support the changes to the jail system.

text: There's no debate about whether the funding is enough because the bill may not pass.

refinement:
California could soon end money bail. Supporters argue that such current practice unfairly punish the poor, but some criminal justice experts say the amended version of the bill will lead to more indefinite detention.

It was unveiled in 2016. The current version of the bill requires pretrial services agencies to be overseen by the county probation department. It also adds a risk assessment tool to differentiate between people to decide who should be detained or released.

Bail agents and lobbyists also stand against the bill, saying that it would decimate the industry.

A bill about funding was opposed because the new bail legislation might not pass.

text: The answer could mention that the risk assessment tools are risky in regard to racial bias.

refinement:
California could soon end money bail. Supporters argue that such current practice unfairly punish the poor, but some criminal justice experts say the amended version of the bill will lead to more indefinite detention.

It was unveiled in 2016. The current version of the bill requires pretrial services agencies to be overseen by the county probation department. It also adds a risk assessment tool to differentiate between people to decide who should be detained or released, which is seen as risky by some to be racially biased.

Bail agents and lobbyists also stand against the bill, saying that it would decimate the industry.

A bill about funding was opposed because the new bail legislation might not pass.

text: Tense mismatch.

refinement:
California could soon end money bail. Supporters argue that such current practice unfairly punishes the poor, but some criminal justice experts say the amended version of the bill will lead to more indefinite detention.

It was unveiled in 2016. The current version of the bill requires pretrial services agencies to be overseen by the county probation department. It also adds a risk assessment tool to differentiate between people to decide who should be detained or released, which is seen as risky by some to be racially biased.

Bail agents and lobbyists also stand against the bill, saying that it would decimate the industry.

A bill about funding was opposed because the new bail legislation might not pass.

text: Indefinite detention: "But the amendments also hand over more control to local courts and probation offices to decide who should remain incarcerated, a move former sponsors of the legislation contend could lead to indefinite detention."

text: End of bail in sight, supporters not excited: "California could soon end money bail, but some of the criminal justice groups who worked toward that goal aren’t celebrating."

text: Oversight: "pretrial services agencies would be overseen by county probation departments"

text: Risk assessment to decide on bail: "Those agencies were to develop a 'risk-assessment tool,' a type of analysis to evaluate people booked into jail to determine whether and under what conditions they should be released."

answer:
A revised bill is about to overhaul the state's bail system. The Senate Bill 10, co-authored by State Sen. Bob Hertzberg, gives judges nearly unlimited discretion on who to lock up. The bill is revised with the idea of transforming a pretrial system that hurts the poor defendants.

The bill has followed some opposing. A few say that the replacement of the money bail system will likely incarcerate more people and use racially biased risk assessments. Lobbyists are also gearing up to oppose the bill stating the changes would decimate their industry.

The proposal is yet not clear and carries a hefty cost for counties.

text: "The bill has followed some opposing." This is confusing wording.

refinement:
A revised bill is about to overhaul the state's bail system. The Senate Bill 10, co-authored by State Sen. Bob Hertzberg, gives judges nearly unlimited discretion on who to lock up. The bill is revised with the idea of transforming a pretrial system that hurts the poor defendants.

The bill has some opposition. A few say that the replacement of the money bail system will likely incarcerate more people and use racially biased risk assessments. Lobbyists are also gearing up to oppose the bill stating the changes would decimate their industry.

The proposal is yet not clear and carries a hefty cost for counties.

text: Lobbyists' opposition should clarify that the changes would decimate the bail industry, not the entire lobbying.

refinement:
A revised bill is about to overhaul the state's bail system. The Senate Bill 10, co-authored by State Sen. Bob Hertzberg, gives judges nearly unlimited discretion on who to lock up. The bill is revised with the idea of transforming a pretrial system that hurts the poor defendants.

The bill has some opposition. A few say that the replacement of the money bail system will likely incarcerate more people and use racially biased risk assessments. Lobbyists are also gearing up to oppose the bill stating the changes would decimate the bail industry.

The proposal is yet not clear and carries a hefty cost for counties.

text: Indefinite detention: "But the amendments also hand over more control to local courts and probation offices to decide who should remain incarcerated, a move former sponsors of the legislation contend could lead to indefinite detention."

text: End of bail in sight, supporters not excited: "California could soon end money bail, but some of the criminal justice groups who worked toward that goal aren’t celebrating."

text: Risk assessment to decide on bail: "Those agencies were to develop a 'risk-assessment tool,' a type of analysis to evaluate people booked into jail to determine whether and under what conditions they should be released."

text: More power to judges and probation offices: "But the amendments also hand over more control to local courts and probation offices to decide who should remain incarcerated"

text: Not in the clear: "But the proposal is not yet in the clear, and it carries a hefty cost for counties."

text: Protect the poor: "Hertzberg later pushed back against criticism of the bill, saying it would dramatically transform a pretrial system that hurts poor defendants."

answer: California is on the verge of ending money-based bail, a move backers say would drastically change the current pretrial release system, which they call unfair due to its tendency to let the wealthy stay out of jail, as long as they can afford bail. The bill, authored by State Sen. Bob Hertzberg, aims to transform a system that is unfair. Despite support from the governor, the state chief justice, and Democratic front-runner Gavin Newsom for governor, controversial amendments were recently added to the bill that led to protests from organizations supporting the bill. Gina Clayton, founder and director of Essie Justice Center, which provides leadership training and services to women with incarcerated loved ones, argues that the revisions would inflate budgets for law enforcement, probation, and corrections. The bill still faces major challenges to its passage, with no guarantee it would pass.

text: The controversial changes aren't mentioned to be recent additions, nor are they added despite the support.

refinement: California is on the verge of ending money-based bail, a move backers say would drastically change the current pretrial release system, which they call unfair due to its tendency to let the wealthy stay out of jail, as long as they can afford bail. The bill, authored by State Sen. Bob Hertzberg, aims to transform a system that is unfair. Gina Clayton, founder and director of Essie Justice Center, which provides leadership training and services to women with incarcerated loved ones, argues that the revisions would inflate budgets for law enforcement, probation, and corrections. The bill still faces major challenges to its passage, with no guarantee it would pass.

text: The answer should mention that some of the bill's former supporters changed tune due to the extensive amount of power it gives to probation offices and judges.

refinement: California is on the verge of ending money-based bail, a move backers say would drastically change the current pretrial release system, which they call unfair due to its tendency to let the wealthy stay out of jail, as long as they can afford bail. The bill, authored by State Sen. Bob Hertzberg, aims to transform a system that is unfair. Some of the bill's former supporters changed tune due to the extensive amount of power it gives to probation offices and judges. Gina Clayton, founder and director of Essie Justice Center, which provides leadership training and services to women with incarcerated loved ones, argues that the revisions would inflate budgets for law enforcement, probation, and corrections. The bill still faces major challenges to its passage, with no guarantee it would pass.

text: Missing Oxford comma.

refinement: California is on the verge of ending money-based bail, a move backers say would drastically change the current pretrial release system, which they call unfair due to its tendency to let the wealthy stay out of jail, as long as they can afford bail. The bill, authored by State Sen. Bob Hertzberg, aims to transform a system that is unfair. Some of the bill's former supporters changed tune due to the extensive amount of power it gives to probation offices and judges. Gina Clayton, founder, and director of Essie Justice Center, which provides leadership training and services to women with incarcerated loved ones, argues that the revisions would inflate budgets for law enforcement, probation, and corrections. The bill still faces major challenges to its passage, with no guarantee it would pass.

text: The answer can mention more of the criticisms against the bill.

refinement: California is on the verge of ending money-based bail, a move backers say would drastically change the current pretrial release system, which they call unfair due to its tendency to let the wealthy stay out of jail, as long as they can afford bail. The bill, authored by State Sen. Bob Hertzberg, aims to transform a system that is unfair. Some of the bill's former supporters changed tune due to the extensive amount of power it gives to probation offices and judges. Another issue raised by John Raphling, a senior researcher at the Human Rights Watch, is that the risk assessment tools are racially biased and likely to increase incarceration. Gina Clayton, founder, and director of Essie Justice Center, which provides leadership training and services to women with incarcerated loved ones, argues that the revisions would inflate budgets for law enforcement, probation, and corrections. The bill still faces major challenges to its passage, with no guarantee it would pass.

text: The first sentence is unnecessarily long.

refinement: California is on the verge of ending money-based bail, a move backers say would drastically change the current pretrial release system. The bill, authored by State Sen. Bob Hertzberg, aims to transform a system that is unfair. Some of the bill's former supporters changed tune due to the extensive amount of power it gives to probation offices and judges. Another issue raised by John Raphling, a senior researcher at the Human Rights Watch, is that the risk assessment tools are racially biased and likely to increase incarceration. Gina Clayton, founder, and director of Essie Justice Center, which provides leadership training and services to women with incarcerated loved ones, argues that the revisions would inflate budgets for law enforcement, probation, and corrections. The bill still faces major challenges to its passage, with no guarantee it would pass.

text: The bill is co-authored by Sen. Hertzberg.

refinement: California is on the verge of ending money-based bail, a move backers say would drastically change the current pretrial release system. The bill, co-authored by State Sen. Bob Hertzberg, aims to transform a system that is unfair. Some of the bill's former supporters changed tune due to the extensive amount of power it gives to probation offices and judges. Another issue raised by John Raphling, a senior researcher at the Human Rights Watch, is that the risk assessment tools are racially biased and likely to increase incarceration. Gina Clayton, founder, and director of Essie Justice Center, which provides leadership training and services to women with incarcerated loved ones, argues that the revisions would inflate budgets for law enforcement, probation, and corrections. The bill still faces major challenges to its passage, with no guarantee it would pass.

text: End of bail in sight, supporters not excited: "California could soon end money bail, but some of the criminal justice groups who worked toward that goal aren’t celebrating."

text: Budget inflation: "Gina Clayton, founder and director of the Essie Justice Center, which provides leadership training and services to women with incarcerated loved ones, argued that Hertzberg’s bill would inflate budgets for law enforcement, probation and corrections."

text: There are various groups opposing the bill, including the bail industry lobbyists and some of the bill's former supporters.


split: train

text:
  The bomb went off on the street. It went 'BANG!' very loud and then the bomb was dead.

  The moment was brief. It happened near the finish line. People were watching the runners run to the line. Fathers cheered their daughters and sisters cheered their brothers and sons were proud of their moms. Even strangers watched and they were proud of them all. There was sun and Coca-Cola and everyone was clapping because the day was important. The running was important. Old wives stood and cheered, 'Yay!' in ripe honeydew voices. Their husbands clapped strong hands and remembered a time.

 And then it happened. 'BANG!'

  At first there was disbelief and smoke and echo. So many stunned runners just stood and they did not run. Some runners had been knocked down by the force of the blast.  They used tired legs to get back up.

But the spectators were finding themselves disoriented, bleeding.

Slowly, people came to and noticed the way about things.

  A woman picked herself up from the concrete and looked to find her sunglasses. She found them, and they were not broken. Then, looking in the lenses, she saw that she was bleeding from her head.

 A man took his daughter's hand and started walking for the car. He kept hurrying and looking back to the cloud of light-grey smoke. He said, 'A bomb,' when the little girl asked him something and then she asked another question and he said, 'I don't know, baby.'

  A mother was sitting up on the sidewalk to see that she had no legs. The mother saw her no legs and looked for her kids. Then she knew the suffocating pain, but she was scared because she could not see the kids. And she screamed for the kids, which hurt. She wanted to vomit, and she almost did.  She could not hear. She could only feel the pain and the burning pepper in her nose and the cement on her back and the burning of her feet. But she yelled for the kids and then she saw a younger man moving swiftly through time. He emerged from a changing sea of empty changing colors. He moved at her and she noticed his face was round and plain with sweat glistening on his forehead and eyes that were blue and frozen calm. And then she saw nothing but she reached her arms out hoping to feel her kids. She felt his hands but she tried to fight him. Then she saw nothing and moved nothing.

The children saw their mother but the loud noise had been so loud that they could not hear and they could only watch their mother bleeding and yelling like an animal. The children watched as one, then two, then more surrounded their mom who was hurt.

  The people swarmed her, and all the kids saw were backs and the bottoms of shoes. The children saw the blood creeping past shards of glass and little pebbles. It snaked towards their shoes. They treated it like lava. The oldest child was crying and he was scared, but he grabbed the other two and let them cry. They stood there next to the wall and cried big gulping wails. A nice lady came then and asked, 'Is that your mom?'

 Sirens were pulsing out in odd rhythms and men were calling over this special music and people were rushing past people rushing past people rushing. The pepper smoke was faint in the air, but it was burned into every nose. There was a dog pulling his own leash through the street.

A man stumbled past a trash can and towards a cluster of people stopped, looking. He was empty and lost because he knew nothing about himself, but he knew he knew what had happened. He looked at the lookers and he said, flailing his arms, 'It just went, 'BANG!' You know?! Just like that. And, just look!' He pointed at the place where the bomb had been, where the lookers had been looking. And he said this over again at the people, 'It just went, 'BANG!' And he wondered if he believed it. 'Just, 'BANG!' Like that!'

One of the lookers came over to him and put her arms around him. She gave him her water. 'It was just like, 'BANG!' he said, and she said softly, 'I know.'

title: TRAGEDY

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who was injured at the bombing?

answer: Runners and spectators were injured

answer: A mother, a daughter, a son, a father, a mother

answer: A woman and her baby.

answer: The people who were at the site of the bomb blast were injured. The mother without legs, the children who watched their mother yell in pain, the man who realized what had happened, and the woman who gave the man her water were all injured.

answer: Most people who were at the bombing were injured, including mothers, fathers, spectators, runners, and children.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Where did the bombing take place?

answer: The bombing took place at a running event near the finish line.

answer: The bombing took place on the street.

answer: Near the finish line

answer: The bombing took place on the street.

answer: The bombing took place at/close to the finish line at the race.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What kind of event did the tragedy occur at?

answer: It's not clear if it was a sporting event or just some kids playing there.

text: Clearly a sporting event

answer: The tragedy occurred at a bomb explosion on a street.

text: Event not location

answer: It appears to be a marathon.

answer: It seems to be a marathon event.

answer: A bomb blast.

text: Tautology, we already know this

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Did any spectators see the suspect?

answer: No, it is clear that when the bomb exploded, all the spectators were affected by it. There is also no evidence of police officers investigating.

answer: This information is undisclosed.

text: Relate more to the story, tell us what the story says.

answer: No, the whole scene (the woman picking herself up from the concrete, the man taking his daughter's hand to run away, the mother calling out for her kids, etc) happened in seconds.

answer: No, it was just the blast and the aftermath.

answer: The lookers did not see the suspect. The explosion happened at a busy event, but no one saw the suspect detonating the bomb.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: A bomb explodes in a bustling sidewalk during a race. Spectators and runners are severely injured. Red cross volunteers are pictured helping the injured. An abrupt voice from the blasts statistics can be heard, saying, "That's a lot..."

text: No clue where the last line comes from or what it's supposed to mean.

refinement: A bomb explodes in a bustling sidewalk during a race. Spectators and runners are severely injured. Red cross volunteers are pictured helping the injured.

answer: A bomb goes off on the street near the finish line of a running event, and pandemonium ensues. The bomb explodes with a loud bang, knocking some runners down and ripping apart bystanders with flying glass and debris. A mother loses both her legs and is screaming for her children, while others wander through the chaos in disbelief or try to help the wounded. The tragic implications of the bomb reach through the whole city in agony.

answer: The story lines center on a street tragedy where a bomb went off before the day's running race in the country. In the aftermath of the explosion, a mother lost her legs, and three children lost their mother. A spectator comforting the mother says, "It was just like 'bang'!" to which the narrator of the story replies, "I know." Then a bewildered man wonders if he can really remember what he remembers.

text: It is not the narrator of the story who says this. Nor

refinement: The story lines center on a street tragedy where a bomb went off before the day's running race in the country. In the aftermath of the explosion, a mother lost her legs, and three children lost their mother. A spectator comforting  says, "It was just like 'bang'!" to which a spectator comforting him replies, "I know." Then a bewildered man wonders if he can really remember what he remembers.

text: The last line does not really happen

refinement: The story lines center on a street tragedy where a bomb went off before the day's running race in the country. In the aftermath of the explosion, a mother lost her legs, and three children lost their mother. A spectator comforting  says, "It was just like 'bang'!" to which a spectator comforting him replies, "I know."

answer: At a city marathon, a bomb explodes at the finish line, toppling bystanders and injuring mothers and children. Amidst the chaos and confusion, people scramble to find loved ones and deal with their confusion and immense pain. The day is ruined and the victims are forever changed by the tragedy.

text: "The day is ruined" is a bit too light for this

refinement: At a city marathon, a bomb explodes at the finish line, toppling bystanders and injuring mothers and children. Amidst the chaos and confusion, people scramble to find loved ones and deal with their confusion and immense pain. The victims are forever changed by the tragedy.

answer: Spectators are cheering on their loved ones at a running event. The blast of a bomb goes off near the finish line and people are bleeding and in disbelief. Spectators and runners are disoriented frantically searching for the loved ones. Sounds of sirens are heard.


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Little princes and princesses (and, let's face it, people of all ages) are invited to a special sing along screening at the Liverpool Empire.

Little Annas, Elsas and Olafs can come along in fancy dress to see a full screening of Disney’s Frozen with lyrics on screen to help you sing along during the film.

The show is introduced by a live host who will guide you through the interactive screening by showing you how to use your free prop bag, warm up your singing voices and teach you some dance moves with the help of the Sing-along-a Princesses.

Tickets are on sale now for a matinée performance on SUNDAY, SEPTEMBER 27 AT 3PM.

Tickets cost from £16.90 for adults, £13.15 for children under 16, or £50.75 for two adults and two kids. For more information and to book tickets online click here.

There is also a special outdoor cinema screening at King’s Gardens in Southport on Friday, September 4 at 8.30pm. Click here for more details.

Take our ultimate Disney Frozen quiz just for grown ups

question: Where is the special sing-along screening taking place?

answer: Liverpool Empire

answer: The special sing-along screening is taking place at the Liverpool Empire.

answer: The Liverpool Empire.

text: don't need capitalization and a period for a sentence fragment

answer: At the Liverpool Empire.

text: don't need capitalization and a period for a sentence fragment

question: What is the name of the movie to be shown at the screening?

answer: Disney's Frozen (with lyrics on screen).

text: don't need a period for a sentence fragment

text: the question does not ask about lyrics on the screen

answer: Frozen

answer: Frozen

answer: Frozen

question: What are the ticket prices?

answer: The ticket prices are £16.90 for adults, £13.15 for children under 16, or £50.75 for two adults and two kids.

answer: £16.90 for adults and £13.15 for children under 16

text: should include the group discount

refinement: £16.90 for adults and £13.15 for children under 16, or £50.75 for two adults and two kids

answer: The ticket prices are £16.90 for adults, £13.15 for children under 16, or £50.75 for two adults and two kids.

answer: The ticket prices are £16.90 for adults, £13.15 for children under 16, or £50.75 for two adults and two kids.

question: Is there going to be a host at the screening?

answer: Yes

text: don't need to capitalize a fragment

answer: Yes, there will be a live host.

answer: There will be a live host.

answer: Yes, there will be a live host who will guide the audience through the interactive screening.

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: The article is an advertisement for a special sing-along screening of Disney's Frozen at the Liverpool Empire. The show is introduced by a live host who will guide you through the interactive screening by showing you how to use your free prop bag, warm up your singing voices, and teach you some dance moves with the help of the Sing-along-a Princesses.

answer:
There will be a special sing-along screen happening at the Liverpool Empire, featuring a live host and Disney's movie, Frozen, with lyrics on screen.

Ticket prices are £16.90 for adults and £13.15 for children under 16.

text: screening, not screen

refinement:
There will be a special sing-along screening at the Liverpool Empire, featuring a live host and Disney's movie, Frozen, with lyrics on screen.

Ticket prices are £16.90 for adults and £13.15 for children under 16.

answer: Fans of Disney's Frozen can come along to a special sing-along screening at the Liverpool Empire. Tickets are on sale now for the matinée performance on September 27th.

answer: Little princes and princesses (and, let's face it, people of all ages) are invited to a special sing along screening at the Liverpool Empire. Little Annas, Elsas and Olafs can come along in fancy dress to see a full screening of Disney’s Frozen with lyrics on screen to help you sing along during the film. The show is introduced by a live host who will guide you through the interactive screening by showing you how to use your free prop bag, warm up your singing voices and teach you some dance moves with the help of the Sing-along-a Princesses.

text: uses too much illustrative language from the article that doesn't work without context

refinement: Little princes and princesses are invited to a special sing along screening at the Liverpool Empire. Children and adults can come in fancy dress to see a full screening of Disney’s Frozen with lyrics on screen to help you sing along during the film. The show is introduced by a live host who will guide you through the interactive screening by showing you how to use your free prop bag, warm up your singing voices and teach you some dance moves with the help of the Sing-along-a Princesses.


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HOLY TRINITY CHURCH (formerly ST MICHAEL'S CHURCH), is in the village of Bolton-le-Sands, Lancashire, England. It is an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. Its benefice is united with that of St Mark, Nether Kellett.[1] The church is recorded in the National Heritage List for England as a designated Grade II* listed building.[2]

History

A church has been on the site since before 1094.[3] The oldest parts of the present church are the tower and the north arcade, which date from the late 15th century. The nave was built in 1813.[4] In 1847 the Lancaster architectural practice of Sharpe and Paley rebuilt the chancel,[5][6] and in 1851 added a pulpit and a reading desk.[7] The church was restored in 1863–64 by E. G. Paley (by this time Sharpe had retired from the practice).[8] In 1881 the practice, now Paley and Austin, carried out further alterations, which included widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit, and a font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, opening the tower arch, replacing windows, reseating the church to accommodate 450 people, and retiling and refitting the chancel.[9]

Architecture

Exterior

The church is constructed in rubble with slate roofs. The tower is in ashlar sandstone, and the south wall of the nave is pebbledashed. Its plan consists of a nave, a north aisle, a south porch, a chancel and a west tower. The tower is in three stages. In the bottom stage is a west door and a three-light window.[10] This window is flanked by niches with pinnacles.[11] The bell openings also have three lights. The tower is supported by diagonal buttresses, and on its summit is a battlemented parapet.[12] At its southwest is a projection for stairs.[13] The windows in the south nave wall contain Perpendicular tracery.[14] The chancel is in Early English style.[15]

Interior

The arcade is in five bays running between the nave and chancel, and the north aisle.[16] It is supported by octagonal piers, other than the second pier from the east, which is rectangular.[17] The nave has a hammerbeam roof, and the chancel roof is scissor-braced.[18] Between the chancel and the aisle is a sandstone memorial to the memory of a man who died in 1642 with the inscription “It is supposed that he lived above 100 yeares”.[19][20] Elsewhere there are 19th-century monuments in Classical style, and brasses dated 1692 and 1872. The reredos is in alabaster and dates from 1897. The stained glass in the west window dates from 1891. It depicts archangels, was designed by Carl Almquist, and made by Shrigley and Hunt.[21] The glass in the chancel windows was designed by William Wailes.[22] Also in the church are two pieces of carved Anglo-Saxon stone dating from the 10th century.[23]

External features

In the churchyard to the south of the church is a square sandstone cross base with two steps. Its age is not known. It is surmounted by a later square block and a 20th-century cross.[24] The churchyard also contains the war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.[25]

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title: Holy Trinity Church, Bolton-le-Sands

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize what happened to the church during the 1800s.

answer: The Lancaster architectural practice, Sharpe and Paley, rebuilt the chancel, added a pulpit and reading desk, remodeled the north aisle, remodeled the church to accommodate 450 people, and added the vestry, a porch, and a font. They also removed the gallery, added a robe and a pulpit, removed the gallery, and replaced the windows. In 1881, the practice expanded the north aisle, added a vestry, a pulpit and a font, lowered the floor, renewed the chancel, and removed the gallery.

text: The answer gets repetitive towards the end. This should be corrected and replaced with details not mentioned.

refinement: The nave was built in 1813. Then, Lancaster architectural practice, Sharpe and Paley, rebuilt the chancel, added a pulpit and reading desk. The church was later restored in 1863-64 by E.G Paley after Sharpe retired. During his tenure, he and Austin carried out more changes to the church, like remodeling the north aisle, reseating the church to accommodate 450 people, and adding a vestry, porch, and font. They also lowered the floor, removed the gallery, opened the tower arch, replaced the windows, and retiled and refitted the chancel. The reredos is in alabaster and dates from 1897. The stained glass in the west window dates from 1891.

answer: In 1847, Sharpe and Paley rebuilt the chancel. In 1851, they added a pulpit and reading desk. In 1863-64, the chancel was restored. By 1881, the church was restored again.

text: The answer fails to mention what changes Paley and Austin made to the church in 1881. The answer should state this.

refinement: In 1847, Sharpe and Paley rebuilt the chancel. In 1851, they added a pulpit and reading desk. In 1863-64, they restored the chancel. By 1881, Paley and Austin made further alterations to the church, such as retiling the chancel, widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, pulpit, font, replacing the windows, etc. They also reseated the church to accommodate 450 people.

text: The first sentence appears monotonous and repetitive. The model should consider rewriting this for flow.

refinement: In 1847, Sharpe and Paley rebuilt the chancel, and in 1851, they added a pulpit and reading desk. Furthermore, in 1863-64, they restored the chancel. By 1881, Paley and Austin made further alterations to the church, such as retiling the chancel, widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, pulpit, font, replacing the windows, etc. They also reseated the church to accommodate 450 people.

answer: Between 1847 and 1881, the church underwent renovations, including widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit, and font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, and retiling and refitting the chancel. The tower features three-light window flanked by niches, diagonal buttresses, and a battlemented parapet. The arcade is in five bays, and the nave features a hammerbeam roof. The churchyard includes the war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

text: The answer fails to mention the nave and when it was built. This should be included in the response.

refinement: The nave was built in 1813. Between 1847 and 1881, the church underwent renovations, including widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit, and font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, and retiling and refitting the chancel. The tower features three-light window flanked by niches, diagonal buttresses, and a battlemented parapet. The arcade is in five bays, and the nave features a hammerbeam roof. The churchyard includes the war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

text: The third sentence of the answer to the end provides irrelevant details that don't directly answer the question. The model should remove these irrelevancies and replace them with the necessary information.

refinement: The nave was built in 1813. Between 1847 and 1881, the church underwent renovations, including widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit, and font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, and retiling and refitting the chancel. The reredos is in alabaster and dates from 1897. The stained glass in the west window dates from 1891.

answer: The nave was built in 1813, the chancel was rebuilt in 1847, and a pulpit and reading desk were added in 1851. It was completely restored in 1863-64 by E. G. Paley. At some point during the 19th century, several monuments were added in Classical style, and there is a brass dated from 1872. In 1881, many alterations were made, including widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, porch, pulpit, and font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, opening the tower arch, replacing windows, reseating to accommodate up to 450 people, and retiling and refitting the chancel. In addition, the church's stained glass west window was made in 1891, and the reredos dates from 1897.

answer: In the 1800s, there were several alterations made to the church exterior and interior. These included widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit and a font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, opening the tower arch, replacing windows and reseating the church. Additionally, a new reredos was created in 1897, and windows created in 1891 by Carl Almquist and William Wailes were added. During this time period, there were also two pieces of carved Anglo-Saxon stone found in the churchyard. Finally, there are also two war graves of British and Canadian soldiers of World War I in the churchyard.

text: The second to the last sentence and the last sentence of the answer is irrelevant to the question. The model should consider removing these sentences.

refinement: In the 1800s, there were several alterations made to the church exterior and interior. These included widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit, and a font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, opening the tower arch, replacing windows, and reseating the church. Additionally, a new reredos was created in 1897, and windows created in 1891 by Carl Almquist and William Wailes were added.

text: The concluding part of the answer is awkwardly structured and should be rewritten.

refinement: In the 1800s, there were several alterations made to the church exterior and interior. These included widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit, and a font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, opening the tower arch, replacing windows, and reseating the church. Additionally, the reredos was created in 1897, and the stained glass on the west windows dates from 1891.

text: The model fails to state that the reredos is in alabaster.

refinement: In the 1800s, there were several alterations made to the church exterior and interior. These included widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit, and a font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, opening the tower arch, replacing windows, and reseating the church. Additionally, the reredos is in alabaster and was created in 1897, and the stained glass on the west windows dates from 1891.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the churchyard?

answer: The churchyard contains the war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

text: The answer omits the square sandstone cross base and the square block with a 20th-century cross. It should mention this as well.

refinement: In the churchyard, the south of the church is a square sandstone cross base with two steps. It is surmounted by a later square block and a 20th-century cross. The churchyard also contains the war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

answer: The churchyard to the south of the church contains a square sandstone cross base with two steps that were built before the church. The cross is dated 20th century and is in the center, surrounded by two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

text:
The text did not say when the square sandstone cross base was built. So, it's inaccurate for the model to state that it was built before the church. The model should consider rewriting or removing that line.
The text does not state that the cross is in the center of the church. The model should consider rewriting this.

refinement: The churchyard to the south of the church contains a square sandstone cross base with two steps. The cross is dated 20th century, surrounded by two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

text: The beginning line of the second sentence is awkwardly structured and should be rewritten.

refinement: The churchyard to the south of the church contains a square sandstone cross base with two steps. The cross is from the 20th century, surrounded by two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

text: The text does not say the cross is surrounded by two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I. It fails to mention their graves. The model should consider rewriting the entire second sentence.

refinement: The churchyard to the south of the church contains a square sandstone cross base with two steps. It is surmounted by a later square block and a 20th-century cross. The churchyard also contains the war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

answer: The churchyard contains war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

answer: The churchyard is to the south of the church and consists of a square sandstone cross base with two steps. Its age is unknown, and it is surmounted by a later square block and a 20th-century cross. It contains the war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

answer: In the churchyard is a sandstone cross base with two steps whose age is unknown. It is surmounted by a square block with a cross on top. The churchyard also contains three war graves from the World War One. On the western wall of the church is a memorial to Richard Cowton, a member of the church, adopted in 1818.

text:
-The answer contains an extraneous detail that is not according to the text. The model should consider removing that line.
-The answer also includes an extraneous 'the' before world war I. This should be removed.
-The overall answer also appears repetitive and monotonous. The model should consider rewriting a part of it.

refinement: In the churchyard is a sandstone cross base with two steps whose age is unknown. A square block surmounts it with a cross on top. The churchyard also contains three war graves from World War I.

text: The answer omits that the cross dates back to the 20th century. It should state this.

refinement: In the churchyard is a sandstone cross base with two steps whose age is unknown. A square block surmounts it with a 20th-century cross on top. The churchyard also contains three war graves from World War I.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the church's use today?

answer: It is an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. It is also recorded in the National Heritage List for England as a designated Grade II* listed building.

text: The answer omits the church's benefice. It should mention this.

refinement: It is an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. The church's benefice unites with St. Mark in Nether Kellett. It is also recorded in the National Heritage List for England as a designated Grade II listed building.

answer: Holy Trinity Church, a church in the village of Bolton-le-Sands, is currently an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. It's benefice is united with that of St Mark in Nether Kelcoett.

text: The answer omits where the church is currently recorded and as what. The model should consider including this.

refinement: Holy Trinity Church, a church in the village of Bolton-le-Sands, is currently an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. It's benefice is united with that of St Mark in Nether Kelcoett. The church is currently recorded in the National Heritage List for England as a designated Grade II listed building.

text:
The model wrongly spells Kellett. This should be corrected.
The model wrongly writes 'it's' to refer to the church. It should consider using the correct pronoun.

refinement: Holy Trinity Church, a church in the village of Bolton-le-Sands, is currently an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. Its benefice is united with that of St Mark in Nether Kellett. The church is currently recorded in the National Heritage List for England as a designated Grade II listed building.

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refinement: Holy Trinity Church, a church in the village of Bolton-le-Sands, is currently an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. Its benefice unites with that of St Mark in Nether Kellett. The church is currently recorded in the National Heritage List for England as a designated Grade II listed building.

answer: The church is currently an active Anglican parish church. It was designated as Grade II* listed and has a tower in ashlar sandstone, a nave with a hammerbeam roof, and a chancel in Early English style. It also has memorials, stained glass, and pieces of carved Anglo-Saxon stone.

text: The answer talks about the church's features which are not relevant to the question. The model should consider removing this and replacing those sentences with pertinent details.

refinement: The church is currently an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. Its benefice unites with that of St Mark in Nether Kellett. The church is currently recorded in the National Heritage List for England as a designated Grade II listed building.

answer: The church is currently an active Anglican parish church.

text: The answer provided is not sufficient to answer the question. The model should consider including more details from the text to answer the question.

refinement: The church is currently an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. The church's benefice unites with St. Mark in Nether Kellett. It is also recorded in the National Heritage List for England as a designated Grade II listed building.