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HOLY TRINITY CHURCH (formerly ST MICHAEL'S CHURCH), is in the village of Bolton-le-Sands, Lancashire, England. It is an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. Its benefice is united with that of St Mark, Nether Kellett.[1] The church is recorded in the National Heritage List for England as a designated Grade II* listed building.[2]

History

A church has been on the site since before 1094.[3] The oldest parts of the present church are the tower and the north arcade, which date from the late 15th century. The nave was built in 1813.[4] In 1847 the Lancaster architectural practice of Sharpe and Paley rebuilt the chancel,[5][6] and in 1851 added a pulpit and a reading desk.[7] The church was restored in 1863–64 by E. G. Paley (by this time Sharpe had retired from the practice).[8] In 1881 the practice, now Paley and Austin, carried out further alterations, which included widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit, and a font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, opening the tower arch, replacing windows, reseating the church to accommodate 450 people, and retiling and refitting the chancel.[9]

Architecture

Exterior

The church is constructed in rubble with slate roofs. The tower is in ashlar sandstone, and the south wall of the nave is pebbledashed. Its plan consists of a nave, a north aisle, a south porch, a chancel and a west tower. The tower is in three stages. In the bottom stage is a west door and a three-light window.[10] This window is flanked by niches with pinnacles.[11] The bell openings also have three lights. The tower is supported by diagonal buttresses, and on its summit is a battlemented parapet.[12] At its southwest is a projection for stairs.[13] The windows in the south nave wall contain Perpendicular tracery.[14] The chancel is in Early English style.[15]

Interior

The arcade is in five bays running between the nave and chancel, and the north aisle.[16] It is supported by octagonal piers, other than the second pier from the east, which is rectangular.[17] The nave has a hammerbeam roof, and the chancel roof is scissor-braced.[18] Between the chancel and the aisle is a sandstone memorial to the memory of a man who died in 1642 with the inscription “It is supposed that he lived above 100 yeares”.[19][20] Elsewhere there are 19th-century monuments in Classical style, and brasses dated 1692 and 1872. The reredos is in alabaster and dates from 1897. The stained glass in the west window dates from 1891. It depicts archangels, was designed by Carl Almquist, and made by Shrigley and Hunt.[21] The glass in the chancel windows was designed by William Wailes.[22] Also in the church are two pieces of carved Anglo-Saxon stone dating from the 10th century.[23]

External features

In the churchyard to the south of the church is a square sandstone cross base with two steps. Its age is not known. It is surmounted by a later square block and a 20th-century cross.[24] The churchyard also contains the war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.[25]

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title: Holy Trinity Church, Bolton-le-Sands

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize what happened to the church during the 1800s.

answer: The Lancaster architectural practice, Sharpe and Paley, rebuilt the chancel, added a pulpit and reading desk, remodeled the north aisle, remodeled the church to accommodate 450 people, and added the vestry, a porch, and a font. They also removed the gallery, added a robe and a pulpit, removed the gallery, and replaced the windows. In 1881, the practice expanded the north aisle, added a vestry, a pulpit and a font, lowered the floor, renewed the chancel, and removed the gallery.

text: The sequence of events in the response such as remodeling the church to fit 450 people and removing the gallery is incorrect. A major rewrite is needed.

refinement: The nave was built in 1813. Lancaster architects Sharpe and Paley rebuilt the chancel in 1847 and added a pulpit and a reading desk in 1851. From 1963 to 1964, the church was restored by E.G. Paley. Classical-style monuments and brasses were added in 1872. In 1881, Paley and his new partner, Austin, made more alterations, including the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, and a font. They also lowered the floor, removed the gallery, opened the tower arch, replaced the windows, reseated the church to accommodate 450 people, and retiled/refit the chancel. Reredos in alabaster was added in 1897 and stained glass windows in 1891.

answer: In 1847, Sharpe and Paley rebuilt the chancel. In 1851, they added a pulpit and reading desk. In 1863-64, the chancel was restored. By 1881, the church was restored again.

text: "the chancel" - this is incorrect. Replace with "the church"

refinement: In 1847, Sharpe and Paley rebuilt the chancel. In 1851, they added a pulpit and reading desk. In 1863-64, the church was restored. By 1881, the church was restored again.

text: The response is missing some details about the 1800s, like the building of the nave in 1813.

refinement: In 1813 the nave was built. In 1847, architects Sharpe and Paley rebuilt the chancel. In 1851, they added a pulpit and reading desk. In 1863-64, the church was restored by Paley. Classical-style monuments and brasses were added in 1872. By 1881, the church was restored again by Paley and Austin (new partner) including major alterations on the north aisle, vestry, porch, floor, and windows, among others. The tower arch was opened and the church was reseated to fit 450 people. Reredos in alabaster was added in 1897 and stained glass windows in 1891.

answer: Between 1847 and 1881, the church underwent renovations, including widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit, and font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, and retiling and refitting the chancel. The tower features three-light window flanked by niches, diagonal buttresses, and a battlemented parapet. The arcade is in five bays, and the nave features a hammerbeam roof. The churchyard includes the war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

text: "The tower features three-light window flanked by niches, diagonal buttresses, and a battlemented parapet. The arcade is in five bays, and the nave features a hammerbeam roof. The churchyard includes the war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I." - this is incorrect as it describes the exterior of the church, not what happened to it during the 1800s.

refinement: Between 1847 and 1881, the church underwent renovations, including widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit, and font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, and retiling and refitting the chancel.

text: The response is missing some important details about the 1800s.

refinement: The nave was built in 1813. Between 1847 and 1881, the church underwent renovations, including widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit, and font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, and retiling and refitting the chancel. The church was also reseated to accommodate 450 people. Classical-style monuments were added in 1872, alabaster reredos in 1897, and stained glass windows in 1891.

answer: The nave was built in 1813, the chancel was rebuilt in 1847, and a pulpit and reading desk were added in 1851. It was completely restored in 1863-64 by E. G. Paley. At some point during the 19th century, several monuments were added in Classical style, and there is a brass dated from 1872. In 1881, many alterations were made, including widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, porch, pulpit, and font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, opening the tower arch, replacing windows, reseating to accommodate up to 450 people, and retiling and refitting the chancel. In addition, the church's stained glass west window was made in 1891, and the reredos dates from 1897.

answer: In the 1800s, there were several alterations made to the church exterior and interior. These included widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit and a font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, opening the tower arch, replacing windows and reseating the church. Additionally, a new reredos was created in 1897, and windows created in 1891 by Carl Almquist and William Wailes were added. During this time period, there were also two pieces of carved Anglo-Saxon stone found in the churchyard. Finally, there are also two war graves of British and Canadian soldiers of World War I in the churchyard.

text: Add a comma to "and"

refinement: In the 1800s, there were several alterations made to the church exterior and interior. These included widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit and a font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, opening the tower arch, replacing windows, and reseating the church. Additionally, a new reredos was created in 1897, and windows created in 1891 by Carl Almquist and William Wailes were added. During this time period, there were also two pieces of carved Anglo-Saxon stone found in the churchyard. Finally, there are also two war graves of British and Canadian soldiers of World War I in the churchyard.

text: Remove "and" and replace it with a comma

refinement: In the 1800s, there were several alterations made to the church exterior and interior. These included widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit, a font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, opening the tower arch, replacing windows, and reseating the church. Additionally, a new reredos was created in 1897, and windows created in 1891 by Carl Almquist and William Wailes were added. During this time period, there were also two pieces of carved Anglo-Saxon stone found in the churchyard. Finally, there are also two war graves of British and Canadian soldiers of World War I in the churchyard.

text: "During this time period, there were also two pieces of carved Anglo-Saxon stone found in the churchyard. Finally, there are also two war graves of British and Canadian soldiers of World War I in the churchyard." - this is inaccurate because the carved Anglo-Saxon stone dates back to the 10th century and there was no mention of it being added in the 1800s. The war graves are irrelevant.

refinement: In the 1800s, there were several alterations made to the church exterior and interior. These included widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit, a font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, opening the tower arch, replacing windows, and reseating the church. Additionally, a new reredos was created in 1897, and windows created in 1891 by Carl Almquist and William Wailes were added.

text: Missing a few details.

refinement: In the 1800s, there were several alterations made to the church exterior and interior. These included building the nave, widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit, a font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, opening the tower arch, replacing windows, and reseating the church. Additionally, a new reredos was created in 1897, and windows created in 1891 by Carl Almquist and William Wailes were added.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the churchyard?

answer: The churchyard contains the war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

text: The response is missing the details about the sandstone cross.

refinement: The churchyard contains the war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I. There is also a square sandstone cross base with two steps can be found, but its age is unknown. It is surmounted by a square block and a 20th-century cross.

answer: The churchyard to the south of the church contains a square sandstone cross base with two steps that were built before the church. The cross is dated 20th century and is in the center, surrounded by two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

text: "The cross is dated 20th century and is in the center, surrounded by two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I." - this is inaccurate. The position of the graves weren't mentioned.

refinement: The churchyard to the south of the church contains a square sandstone cross base with two steps that were built before the church. It is surmounted by a square block and a 20th-century cross. The churchyard also contains the graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

answer: The churchyard contains war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

text: The response is missing the detail about the ancient sandstone cross.

refinement: The churchyard contains war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I. There is a square sandstone base with two steps. Its age is not known. It's surmounted by a square block and a 20th-century cross.

answer: The churchyard is to the south of the church and consists of a square sandstone cross base with two steps. Its age is unknown, and it is surmounted by a later square block and a 20th-century cross. It contains the war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

answer: In the churchyard is a sandstone cross base with two steps whose age is unknown. It is surmounted by a square block with a cross on top. The churchyard also contains three war graves from the World War One. On the western wall of the church is a memorial to Richard Cowton, a member of the church, adopted in 1818.

text: "the World War One" - replace with "World War I"

refinement: In the churchyard is a sandstone cross base with two steps whose age is unknown. It is surmounted by a square block with a cross on top. The churchyard also contains three war graves from World War I. On the western wall of the church is a memorial to Richard Cowton, a member of the church, adopted in 1818.

text: "On the western wall of the church is a memorial to Richard Cowton, a member of the church, adopted in 1818." - this information does not exist and should be removed.

refinement: In the churchyard is a sandstone cross base with two steps whose age is unknown. It is surmounted by a square block with a cross on top. The churchyard also contains three war graves from World War I.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the church's use today?

answer: It is an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. It is also recorded in the National Heritage List for England as a designated Grade II* listed building.

text: The response is missing a detail.

refinement: It is an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. Its benefice is united with that of St. Mark, Nether Kellett. It is also recorded in the National Heritage List for England as a designated Grade II* listed building.

answer: Holy Trinity Church, a church in the village of Bolton-le-Sands, is currently an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. It's benefice is united with that of St Mark in Nether Kelcoett.

text: "It's" - replace with "Its"

refinement: Holy Trinity Church, a church in the village of Bolton-le-Sands, is currently an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. Its benefice is united with that of St Mark in Nether Kelcoett.

answer: No answer

text: The response can't be blank because the information is available.

refinement: Holy Trinity Church is in the village of Bolton-le-Sands, Lancashire, England. It is an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. Its benefice is united with that of St. Mark, Nether Kellett. The church is recorded in the National Heritage List for England as a designated Grade II* listed building.

answer: The church is currently an active Anglican parish church. It was designated as Grade II* listed and has a tower in ashlar sandstone, a nave with a hammerbeam roof, and a chancel in Early English style. It also has memorials, stained glass, and pieces of carved Anglo-Saxon stone.

text: "has a tower in ashlar sandstone, a nave with a hammerbeam roof, and a chancel in Early English style. It also has memorials, stained glass, and pieces of carved Anglo-Saxon stone." - extraneous information that should be removed.

refinement: The church is currently an active Anglican parish church. It was designated as Grade II* listed.

text: The response is missing a few details.

refinement: The church is in the village of Bolton-le-Sands, Lancashire, England, and is currently an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. It was designated as a Grade II* listed building and is recorded in the National Heritage List for England. Its benefice is united with that of St. Mark, Nether Kellett.

answer: The church is currently an active Anglican parish church.

text: The response is missing several details.

refinement: Holy Trinity Church is currently an active Anglican parish church in the village of Bolton-le-Sands, Lancashire, England. It is part of the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. Its benefice is united with that of St. Mark, Nether Kellett. The church is recorded in the National Heritage List for England as a designated Grade II* listed building.


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I am trying to be a writer, I would like opinions.  Feel free to be as harsh or as flattering as you want, in my eyes its all constructive.  It might be a bit hard to figure out, so I guess also comment on what you think its about.

	The lights were flickering on and off.  He came into view three or four times.  Large bursts of light erupting from a pitch black abyss.  In the room, there were no sounds, no breaths, no heart beats.  When the lights were on the black abyss turned into a room, and the room was all white with blisteringly powerful light spraying off everywhere.  When the lights turned on, maybe a half a second, maybe three quarters, I was able to make out a figure.  Large, dark and angry.  Eyes completely yellow, staring me down.  My eyes reflected in his, the reflection so bright, how could I possibly look away.  I shoved my hands against my temples and squeezed, the man falling in and out of my sight.  The light turned off, a wave of black falling over me, like a midnight black blanket being wrapped around my head on a bright day.  I fell over slightly and felt nauseous.  I tripped on my own feet and my head banged against the floor, or the wall, I’m not really sure which.  At times like these I always ran to the door, kicking and screaming to let me out, to let me breathe, but I always heard the same words every time I banged the door, “anesthesia.”  I would loose track of the door at that point.  First it was on the left, then it was on the right.  Rotating around me like the orbit of a moon sped up.
	They would always turn the lights on at the worst moment, right when I would close my eyes, right when I was going to get some rest finally.  I was a child waiting for a Christmas that never came.  Sometimes, during these fits of light, I would catch the faint glimmer of a shadow over me.  The shadow of a demon like being with the horns of a devil and the knife of a butcher.  Picking and pulling at my well being, the chords of thought being plucked right from under me.  I was never able to move at these moments, never able to reach out my hand and grasp the ephemeral hand over me.  The lights started to flicker again, in and out.  If I was a bucket of sand, they would be emptying me gradually, and each grain of sand that would fall out would just disappear as it left the bucket, with each flicker of the light this would continue to happen.  The bang and the light coming and going from those in front of me who were never actually in front of me.  A worthless fight.
	How long has it been?  A week?  A month?  I’d bang on the door when I could find it.  I’d yell my name just to yell it, just to gain something from a lost experience, right up until that was lost too.  And when I’d yell, I’d cry, because I was yelling my life, my upbringing, my experiences.  After each yell, it would go, after each cry I’d forget.  And on that final day, when there was nothing left to yell, I’d wake up.
	I would wake up lying down, people in white standing over me with light shining down and red tools lying next to me.  Everything is in front of me, but I cant grasp it.  Like a fisherman trying to grab the reflection of a fish going by with his bare hands.  Except now, I am all empty.

title: This is my story (read and criticize)

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Is the narrator locked somewhere?

answer: It seems that he/she is overstimulated in confinement. This also possibly explains why the narrator seems to not remember who they are and when they have grown up.

answer: Yes, the lights would come on and off.

answer: Yes, the narrator appears to be locked in some room or space with no sound or light. The narrator is constantly plagued by bright lights and shadowy figures which do not allow him/her to rest. The narrator appears scared, and ultimately afraid of being slowly drained of one's being.

answer: Yes, the narrator is locked somewhere and subjected to troubling light and figure images. The result is pain and confusion.

answer: Yes, the narrator is locked in a room. The lights of the room are mostly switched off so he cannot figure what the room looks like.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What did the demon look like?

answer: The demon had a face made of flesh and had horns.

text: There is no evidence in the story suggesting that the demon's face was made of flesh.

text: It is omitted that he held a butcher's knife and had yellow eyes.

refinement: The demon had yellow eyes and horns like a devil and held a butcher's knife.

answer: The demon had yellow eyes, he was large and had horns. He held a butcher's knife.

answer: The demon was large with eyes completely yellow and horns of a devil. He was picking and pulling at the protagonist's well being with each flicker of light.

text: It is omitted that he held a butcher's knife.

refinement: The demon was large with eyes completely yellow and horns of a devil, he also held a butcher's knife. He was picking and pulling at the protagonist's well being with each flicker of light.

text: "Well being" is incorrect. To form a noun, the two words must be hyphenated; well-being.

refinement: The demon was large with eyes completely yellow and horns of a devil, he also held a butcher's knife. He was picking and pulling at the protagonist's well-being with each flicker of light.

answer: The demon looked large and menacing with yellow eyes and horns. The demon would appear intermittently in blinding light and would pick at the protagonist.

text: It is omitted that he held a butcher's knife.

refinement: The demon looked large and menacing with yellow eyes, horns, and held a bitcher's knife. The demon would appear intermittently in blinding light and would pick at the protagonist.

answer: It was large and dark. It had yellow eyes.

text: It is omitted that the devil had horns and held a butcher's knife.

refinement: It was large and dark. It had yellow eyes and horns like a devil, it also held a butcher's knife.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What did it feel like being locked inside the room?

answer: It was an uncomfortable feeling, a limbo state. Irregular distractions and abrupt sounds caused the protagonist to have chronic migraines, nausea, and general pain. It is portrayed as a state of languid, dazed "in-between" which is intensified through being completely alone. The colors contrast with the black, chrome, and white of the room.

answer: It felt like he was in a glass bubble. He was angry for being trapped and wanted help but the light was always on so he was effectively being dehydrated.

text: It is incorrect that the lights were always on.

refinement: It felt like he was in a glass bubble. He was angry for being trapped and wanted help.

text: The fact that the narrator kicks the door, is evidence that he was angry about being trapped.

answer: The narrator felt completely lost. He had lost track of time. The room was completely dark and he felt nauseous. Irritated by his situation, he would kick the door and scream to let him out.

answer: The sensation of being locked inside the room felt horrific; the room was bleak and filled with nothing but blinding light. When the lights were off, there was a complete lack of sound and movement. The mysterious figure with yellow eyes would come into view periodically, and the reflection of oneself was blinding and impossible to ignore. Every time the lights flicked on, it felt like a wave of black, drowning the individual who had barely any control over their surroundings. The individual was unprepared and vulnerable in this scenario. They felt powerless and scared, which resulted in shouting and crying out for anyone to hear their existence. Ultimately, there were moments when nothing was left to yell or cry about, and the individual woke up to find themselves surrounded by strangers in a sterile room.

text: There is no evidence that the room the narrator wakes up in is sterile.

refinement: The sensation of being locked inside the room felt horrific; the room was bleak and filled with nothing but blinding light. When the lights were off, there was a complete lack of sound and movement. The mysterious figure with yellow eyes would come into view periodically, and the reflection of oneself was blinding and impossible to ignore. Every time the lights flicked on, it felt like a wave of black, drowning the individual who had barely any control over their surroundings. The individual was unprepared and vulnerable in this scenario. They felt powerless and scared, which resulted in shouting and crying out for anyone to hear their existence. Ultimately, there were moments when nothing was left to yell or cry about, and the individual woke up to find themselves surrounded by strangers in white.

answer: The main feeling was one of isolation and helplessness. There was nothing to do but wait in the darkness for when the lights would pierce through, and when they would there would be danger within. There was no escape. This feeling became progressively more severe the further the pattern persisted until all that was left was emptiness.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Is the narrator dreaming?

answer: Yes

text: There is no evidence suggesting that the story is a dream.

answer: It is unclear. The narrator might be dreaming or hallucinating due to anesthetic usage. Regardless, the description is very surreal.

answer: This information is not mentioned.

answer: Most likely it seems that the narrator is in a sort of psychosis. He's hearing voices and experience delusions of grandeur. It could be a dream, such as a lucid dream.

answer: Yes, at least at the beginning of the passage, the narrator is dreaming about being stuck in a room with bright lights coming on periodically, and being pursued by a dark figure. The lights are effects of sleep deprivation, and the figures are representations of recurring dream images. Towards the end, the narrator wakes up (presumably to reality) and is surrounded by people in white, likely doctors or medical personnel.

text: There is no evidence that the narrator is dreaming.

refinement: It is unclear but it seems like he was dreaming at least at the beginning of the passage, the narrator is dreaming about being stuck in a room with bright lights coming on periodically, and being pursued by a dark figure. The lights are effects of sleep deprivation, and the figures are representations of recurring dream images. Towards the end, the narrator wakes up (presumably to reality) and is surrounded by people in white, likely doctors or medical personnel.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer:
The narrator was locked inside a dark room. The lights would turn on for hardly a second and he would witness a large, dark, and angry demon staring right back at him.

He would scream and kick the door to let him out but they wouldn't. He had forgotten how long had he been in there.

answer: The story is in first-person and seems to be about an unpleasant experience. The narrator is in a room of almost total darkness. There, they see a demonic figure. With the lights occasionally catching glimpses of it, the narrator is able to see a reflection in the man's eyes. The narrator longs to escape but someone keeps turning the lights on.

text: It is incorrect that the narrator sees the reflection in a man's eyes.

refinement: The story is in first-person and seems to be about an unpleasant experience. The narrator is in a room of almost total darkness. There, they see a demonic figure. With the lights occasionally catching glimpses of it, the narrator is able to see a reflection in the demon's eyes. The narrator longs to escape but someone keeps turning the lights on.

answer: The protagonist experiences bizarre hallucinations during times of extreme stress. The hallucinations consist of lights flashing in the dark and shadow figures. Eventually, the protagonist wakes up in a hospital ward with no memory of what has happened to them.

answer: The narrator is in an isolation room with no sounds or lights. They hallucinate and are very lonely. They also bang on a door to let them out when they want to rest, but they never succeed. In this unknown period of time they find it hard to stay cognizant.

text: It is omitted that the narrator sees a demon.

refinement: The narrator is in an isolation room with no sounds or lights. They hallucinate and are very lonely, they see a demon-like figure. They also bang on a door to let them out when they want to rest, but they never succeed. In this unknown period of time they find it hard to stay cognizant.

text: There is no evidence that he was hallucinating.

refinement: The narrator is in an isolation room with no sounds or lights. It seems like they hallucinate and are very lonely, they see a demon-like figure. They also bang on a door to let them out when they want to rest, but they never succeed. In this unknown period of time they find it hard to stay cognizant.

answer: This is the story of a protagonist living in constant darkness, whose only moments of light come when he is being tortured by a shadowy figure. The protagonist's memory fades in and out, but each time he wakes up from this torture, he forgets what has happened. In the end, he is revealed to be undergoing some sort of surgery without his consent.

text: There is no evidence that he was undergoing the surgery without his consent.

refinement: This is the story of a protagonist living in constant darkness, whose only moments of light come when he is being tortured by a shadowy figure. The protagonist's memory fades in and out, but each time he wakes up from this torture, he forgets what has happened. In the end, he is revealed to be undergoing some sort of surgery.


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BASÍLIO DE BRAGANÇA PEREIRA (born 29 April 1945 in Rio de Janeiro) is a Brazilian statistician.

He studied at Escola Nacional de Ciências Estatísticas since 1958 until his BSc in Statistics (1968), and obtained his Ph.D.and D.I.C. from the Imperial College of Science, Technology and Medicine (1976) supervised by Sir David Cox. He also obtained an MSc in Operational Research (1970) and a Docent Free in Applied Statistics (1989) from Universidade Federal do Rio de Janeiro.[1]

In 2003 he spent a year working on a Project on Neural Networks in Statistics with Professor C.R. Rao at Penn State University on a postdoctoral grant from the Brazilian Government (CAPES).

He is Professor Emeritus of the Universidade Federal do Rio de Janeiro where he has worked since 1970, in the Institute of Mathematics, Postgraduate School of Engineering (COPPE) and School of Medicine.[2] Associate Professor at the Institute of Mathematics (1970–1989 and 1994–1997), Research Professor at COPPE (1970–present), Titular Professor of Applied Statistics at COPPE (1989–1994, retired), Titular Professor of Biostatistics at the School of Medicine (1998–2015, retired). He has supervised more than 80 thesis and dissertations. Since 2018, he is a Courtesy Researcher at National Laboratory for Scientific Computing (LNCC).

He was Elected member of the International Statistical Institute.[3] His current statistical interests are Applications of Statistical Learning Methods in Medicine, acting mainly in choice of separated models, likelihood and Bayesian inference, time series, regression and survival analysis, neural networks in statistics.

Books

-   PEREIRA, B. de B.; RAO, Calyampudi Radhakrishna.; OLIVEIRA, F. B.;Statistical Learning Using Neural Networks: A Guide for Statisticians and Data Scientists with Python, CRC Press, London, 2020.
-   PEREIRA, B. de B.; PEREIRA, C. A. de B. Model Choice in Nonnested Families, Springer, London, 2016.
-   SANTOS, A. M.; PEREIRA, B de B. Modelos Gráficos e Aplicações. 56a RBRAS e 14o SEAGRO, Maringa, 2011, 56p 1
-   PEREIRA, B. de B. ; RAO, Calyampudi Radhakrishna. Data Mining Using Neural Networks: A Guide for Statisticians. State College, Pennsylvania, 2009. 186 p.
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title: Basilio de Bragança Pereira

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What part of Pereira's education is more prominent in his role as a Titular Professor of Biostatistics?

answer: Pereira's titles of Associate Professor of Applied Statistics at COPPE and Titular Professor of Biostatistics at the School of Medicine indicate that his main academic emphasis is in the field of Biostatistics.

text: Remove the reference to his Associate Professorship as it's not relevant to the question, and adjust the sentence grammatically as needed.

refinement: Pereira's title of Titular Professor of Biostatistics at the School of Medicine indicates that his main academic emphasis is in the field of Biostatistics.

text: Add that this indicates his PhD is the most prominent, as the highest level.

refinement: Pereira's title of Titular Professor of Biostatistics at the School of Medicine indicates that his main academic emphasis is in the field of Biostatistics. This indicates his PhD is the most prominent, as it is his highest level of education in the field.

answer: The Imperial College of Science, Technology and Medicine.

text: Add the qualification/education he received there - a PhD and DIC.

refinement: Pereira's PhD and DIC obtained from The Imperial College of Science, Technology and Medicine.

answer: He has a BSc in Statistics. Additionally, his Ph.D. is from the Imperial College of Science, Technology, and Medicine.

answer: Pereira's PhD in Statistics from the Imperial College of Science, Technology and Medicine is the most prominent part of his education that pertains to his role as Titular Professor of Biostatistics.

answer: Statisticians are usually BSc and PhD holders, and doing post-doctoral projects increases your odds of compiling more degrees from that level. Pereira is also an Associate Professor in Applied Statistics, where his focus could be honed and pertains to Professors who only teach and focus on research rather than both teaching and research.

text: Remove this answer, it's confusing and doesn't answer the question.

text: Empty response.

refinement: Pereira's PhD in Statistics from the Imperial College of Science, Technology and Medicine is the most prominent part of his education that pertains to his role as Titular Professor of Biostatistics.


text:
I'm well into mid-life, have earned both kinds of bachelor's degrees--arts and science--and have given countless presentations as part of this education, as well as through my workin corporate communications. Yet, public speaking has never been something I enjoy doing, mostly because it feels like my nerves wreck everything.

I just finished a book which may be an antidote to my awkwardness in front of a group. In "Five Stars: The Communication Secrets to Get From Good to Great," bestselling author Carmine Gallo lays out exactly how to tell a compelling story, which he explains is the cornerstone of any good pitch, presentation or interview.

While I tell stories on a page all the time, presenting to an audience in-person is an entirely different animal. The written medium is editable, but you've only got one shot when you're talking to a roomful of faces, or even when you're selling yourself or an idea to someone one-on-one.

You need good stories to rock an interview

Gallo tells many stories throughout his book, including that of former poker champion Haseeb Qureshi, who became a millionaire playing cards, but left the game behind to go to Silicon Valley where he learned to code in a year and set off to get hired by a tech company. While he didn't have the kind of talent or experience of others competing for the jobs he was going after, what he did well was perfect his compelling story--the one which was so good it set of a frenzy of offers from the likes of Yelp, Google, Uber and Stripe. The best offer, and the one he accepted, was from Airbnb and worth $250,000 a year. Qureshi's advice for crafting your story:

  Consider yourself a character in a story and structure the story with a beginning, middle and end. There should be inflection points, characters, and easy-to-understand motivations. Keep it as short as possible, while preserving the color that makes you interesting. When they ask, 'Tell us about a challenging bug you faced and how you solved it?,' tell a story.

Gallo writes that Qureshi practiced the stories he used in interviews over and over, recorded himself doing it and got feedback from others.

A good story doesn't blather on

Gallo discusses the reason TED Talks don't go past 18 minutes--anything longer is a recipe for audience boredom. In fact, some of the best stories are much, much shorter. Many of the ones he cites in the book can be delivered in about a minute. "One of the challenges with storytelling is keeping the audience's attention without putting them to sleep with a long, ponderous story," he writes. "Details are vital, but it takes practice and feedback to keep your stories compelling and brief."

Your story needs tension, struggle and a happy ending

Gallo describes the classic three-act storytelling structure, which involves three parts: the set-up, the confrontation and the resolution. It's a framework commonly used in Hollywood screenwriting, as well as in the startup world wherein founders sell their stories to elicit buy-in from investors, customers and consumers. Take Airbnb CEO Brian Chesky. While Gallo takes a couple of pages to script the story, basically it comes down to:

_THE SETUP_: Two friends in San Francisco need money, rent out a couple of air mattresses on their floor and decide to turn the idea into a business.

_THE CONFLICT_: Chesky has no money for food, loses 20 pounds and vacillates between stress and overconfidence in the idea of people renting out their couches and bedrooms to strangers. Investors walk away from the opportunity to own 20 percent of the now $30 billion company for only $100,000.

_THE RESOLUTION_: Even after missing the deadline for application (more tension), Airbnb gets into the highly selective Silicon Valley accelerator Y Combinator.

This strategy which keeps an audience in suspense and includes tension, struggle and a happy ending, triggers a release of oxytocin in listeners' brains, Gallo writes.

I could highlight several other storytelling principles Gallo includes in the book, but you're probably better off reading through the whole thing yourself. Of the many self-improvement books I've read in the last six months, this one is hands-down the most helpful, at least for someone like me who doesn't see herself as a naturally gifted orator.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize what the author of this review thinks are the highlights of "Five Stars: The Communication Secrets to Get from Good to Great".

answer: The author regards this book as novel as it is easy to read. Gallo provides supporting examples. The author thinks The Communication Secrets to Get from Good to Great is helpful, quite comprehensive and quite comprehensive.

text:
- The book isn't a novel, it's non-fiction.
- The article doesn't say it was "easy to read".

refinement: The author regards this book as one of the best self-help books he has read in the past six months. He believes the author gave good analogies to complement his explanations on public speaking. The author thinks The Communication Secrets to Get from Good to Great is helpful, quite comprehensive and quite comprehensive.

text: The last sentence of the response has a bit of repetition in it.

refinement: The author regards this book as one of the best self-help books he has read in the past six months. He believes the author gave good analogies to complement his explanations on public speaking. The author thinks The Communication Secrets to Get from Good to Great is helpful and quite comprehensive.

answer: The author highlights the importance of storytelling in general. The author also mentions the importance of practicing and getting feedback from others. The author also mentions the importance of having a beginning, middle, and end.

text: The response did not give the relevant facts in relation to the book.

refinement: The author believes the book highlights the importance of storytelling in general. The author also notes that the book explains the importance of practicing and getting feedback from others as well as the importance of having a structured story that has a beginning, middle, and end.

answer: This book highlights a series of stories told by Carmine Gallo to offer advice on how to be a compelling storyteller. The author is quite clear here when he says that storytelling is a key part of any good pitch, presentation or interview. The book gallantly encapsulates seven ways in which Carmine Gallo believes storytelling can help you craft a successful pitch, a good presentation and an effective interview.

text: The review has nothing on seven ways in which storytelling can help craft a successful pitch and effective interview.

refinement: This book highlights a series of stories told by Carmine Gallo to offer advice on how to be a compelling storyteller. The author is quite clear here when he says that storytelling is a key part of any good pitch, presentation or interview. The book gallantly encapsulates several ways in which Carmine Gallo believes storytelling can help you craft a successful pitch, a good presentation, and an effective interview.

answer: eith The Communication Secrets to Get from Good to Great.

text: The response offers little in the way of answer to the question.

refinement: The author believes The Communication Secrets to Get from Good to Great is one of the best self-improvement books he has read in the past six months. He highlights the storytelling principles in the book, some of which are: keeping stories short and structured; practicing your speech in front of friends and loved ones in other to receive feedback as well as keeping your audience in suspension.

answer: The author thinks the book is helpful for anyone who is not a naturally gifted orator. The author thinks this book is the most helpful of the many self-improvement books they have read in the last six months.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Describe the stages of good storytelling.

answer: The stages of good storytelling are the set-up, confrontation, and resolution. The set-up is where the story starts. The confrontation is where the story becomes difficult. The resolution is where the story ends.

answer: The stages of good storytelling include the setup, conflict and resolution.

text: The response does not describe as instructed.

refinement: The stages of good storytelling include the setup, conflict, and resolution. The setup is the beginning of the story, the setting, and the introduction of characters. The conflict is the clash of ideals, the seemingly insurmountable problems faced by the protagonist. The resolution is how the problem became solved; the triumph of the protagonist.

answer: The book Five Stars: The Communication Secrets to Get From Good to Great by Carmine Gallo describes the three stages of good storytelling.

answer: The stages are "set-up, confrontation, and resolution".

answer: The stages of good storytelling include the set-up, conflict and resolution.

answer: The book Five Stars: The Communication Secrets to Get From Good to Great by Carmine Gallo describes the three stages of good storytelling. It says that the set up, confrontation, and the resolution make up the classic three-act structure. The author describes that the early stages of stories are to set the stage, establish the characters in the story, lay out the motivations and its arc. The tension, struggle, and resolution entice the audience according to the author. The resolution of stories gives them a feeling of fulfillment and happiness. This is what they describe as the happy ending. Happy endings hold the audience in suspense to keep them wanting more.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Explain the author's (of this article) intention in writing this review.

answer: The author is a public speaker who is self-conscious about public speaking. The author is looking for ways to improve his public speaking skills. The author wants to improve his public speaking skills so that he can make a good impression on his audience.

answer: The author of this article is writing about a book that may be an antidote to their public speaking anxiety. The author is writing about how the book helped them overcome their public speaking anxiety.

text: The author of the article isn't writing a book.

refinement: The author of this article wants to share with his readers how helpful "Five Stars: The Communication Secrets to Get From Good to Great" has been in teaching him how to be an effective public speaker.

answer: The author is hoping to help with the problem of public speaking by reviewing this book. She thinks that this book is helpful to her, and she is hoping other people feel the same way.

text: The last sentence isn't entirely backed up by the article.

refinement: The author is hoping to help with the problem of public speaking by reviewing this book. She thinks that this book is helpful to her, and she is hoping to help others by recommending the book.

answer: The author of this article is writing about a book that may be an antidote to their public speaking anxiety. The author is writing about how the book helped them overcome their public speaking anxiety. The author is also writing about their intention in writing this review.

answer: The author writes an article reviewing the use of stories in a recently read publication.

text: This response is technically correct, however, there is more going on with the article than just a throwaway review.

refinement: The author writes an article reviewing the use of stories in a recently read publication. He wants to help people by recommending a book with has improved his public speaking.

answer: The author writes an article that reviews a recently read publication's advice on how to improve skills with public speaking by using a good story.

answer: The author is a public speaker who is self-conscious about public speaking. The author is looking for ways to improve his public speaking skills. The author wants to improve his public speaking skills so that he can make a good impression on his audience. The author is looking for ways to improve his public speaking skills so that he can sell his ideas to his audience.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize how this text relates to public speaking.

answer: The author of this text is not a naturally gifted orator. The author believes that public speaking is a challenge for them. The author believes that the book Five Stars: The Communication Secrets to Get From Good to Great by Carmine Gallo is the antidote to their public speaking woes. In the book, Gallo discusses the importance of having a compelling story, and how to tell one. The author believes that Gallo's book is the most helpful in the last six months. The author lists a few principles from the book, including that good stories don't blather on and that a good story needs tension, struggle and a happy ending.

answer: The author says that public speaking is something they have never enjoyed doing, mostly because of the nerves. They have given countless presentations as part of their education and work in corporate communications. They have just finished a book that may be an antidote to their awkwardness in front of a group. The book is called Five Stars: The Communication Secrets to Get From Good to Great. In this book, the author lays out how to tell a compelling story. The author says that public speaking is an entirely different animal than writing. The author says that the written medium is editable, but you only have one shot when you're talking to a roomful of faces or selling yourself or an idea to someone one-on-one. The author discusses the reason TED Talks don't go past 18 minutes, anything longer is a recipe for audience boredom. The author discusses the classic three-act storytelling structure, which involves three parts: the set-up, the confrontation, and the resolution. The author says that this structure triggers a release of oxytocin in listeners' brains.

text: The use of "they" in referring to the author is grammatically incorrect.

refinement: The author says that public speaking is something they have never enjoyed doing, mostly because of the nerves. He has given countless presentations as part of their education and work in corporate communications. He has just finished a book that may be an antidote to their awkwardness in front of a group. The book is called Five Stars: The Communication Secrets to Get From Good to Great. In this book, the author lays out how to tell a compelling story. The author says that public speaking is an entirely different animal than writing. The author says that the written medium is editable, but you only have one shot when you're talking to a roomful of faces or selling yourself or an idea to someone one-on-one. The author discusses the reason TED Talks don't go past 18 minutes, anything longer is a recipe for audience boredom. The author discusses the classic three-act storytelling structure, which involves three parts: the set-up, the confrontation, and the resolution. The author says that this structure triggers a release of oxytocin in listeners' brains.

answer: The text relates how to public speaking by following the informations dictated in the book. The author advises to think of themselves as characters in a story. They need to the story to begin, middle, end, with inflection points and clear motivations. Stories should be kept to their requisite length, and should be practiced multiple times.

text: The response is clunky, especially the first and second sentences. The phrase "The text relates how to public speaking..." is grammatically incorrect. The third sentence starts with "They", which distorts the meaning of the sentence as well.

refinement: The text discusses how to improve one's ability to speak in public according to the methods laid out by "Five Stars: The Communication Secrets to Get From Good to Great". It highlights the importance of thinking of yourself as a character in a story. The text focuses on the need to structure your narrative or speech into a beginning, middle, and end as well as keep it short so as to keep your audience interested.

answer: The author of this text is not a naturally gifted orator. The author believes that public speaking is a challenge for them. The author believes that the book Five Stars: The Communication Secrets to Get From Good to Great by Carmine Gallo is the antidote to their public speaking woes. In the book, Gallo discusses the importance of having a compelling story, and how to tell one. The author believes that Gallo's book is the most helpful in the last six months.

answer: The author says that public speaking is something they have never enjoyed doing, mostly because of the nerves. They have given countless presentations as part of their education and work in corporate communications. They have just finished a book that may be an antidote to their awkwardness in front of a group. The book is called Five Stars: The Communication Secrets to Get From Good to Great. In this book, the author lays out how to tell a compelling story. The author says that public speaking is an entirely different animal than writing. The author says that the written medium is editable, but you only have one shot when you're talking to a roomful of faces or selling yourself or an idea to someone one-on-one. The author discusses the reason TED Talks don't go past 18 minutes, anything longer is a recipe for audience boredom. The author discusses the classic three-act storytelling structure, which involves three parts: the set-up, the confrontation, and the resolution.

answer: Public speaking is a very uncomfortable situation for an author. Even though this author has given many presentations, public speaking still isn't enjoyable, mostly because of nerves. The text suggests a perfect antidote to nervousness; get an oral story to be compelling for an interview/presentation. This can be difficult to work on and improve. Fortunately, the book gives the author the tools to overcome their nerves.

answer: Public speaking is a very uncomfortable situation for an author. Even though this author has given many presentations, public speaking still isn't enjoyable, mostly because of nerves. Comfort and success are relative, as even public speaking requires practice to lift those nerves. This can be difficult to work on and improve. Fortunately, the book gives the author the tools to overcome their nerves.


text:
Justice (C) 2012-2013 Victor D. Lopez
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Time: The all too near future
Place: A courtroom
Setting: Final sentencing for the last remaining capital offense on the books of an apparently kinder, gentler more just world where equality is no longer a mere aspiration.
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Justice

The prisoner stared impassively into the camera. The bright lights causing beads of sweat to form above his eyes and forcing him to squint, his perspiration-soaked thinning hair flattened unflatteringly against his forehead. No sound could be heard other than the faint hum of the air conditioning whose airflow was directed from the high ceiling above the high seats of the three judge panel, towards the three judged, keeping their immediate area comfortably cool. The camera trained on them remained a respectful distance away, and no harsh lights illuminated their somber countenances.

All three judges stared at the camera showing no emotion, their hands folded in front of them on the surface of their capacious bench on top of three equal, neat stacks of paper piled before each judge. Everywhere on earth citizens watched the unfolding drama over the neural net that provided a fully immersive experience indistinguishable from reality, effectively placing every citizen of earth in the courtroom as the Chief Judge began to speak in a deep, resonant, clear voice.

“The evidence against you has been examined. This tribunal finds you guilty of the charges against you by a unanimous vote. Have you anything you would like to add before we pass sentence?”

The camera changed back to the prisoner. The lights brightens around him and the heat rises perceptibly, adding fresh fuel to the trickle of sweat flowing down his flushed face, causing a bead of sweat to form at the end of his nose that he cannot swat away because his wrists are restrained by metal bands at the armrests of his chair, outside the viewing range of the camera which has a tight zoom on his face. “I am guilty of no crime,” the prisoner spoke in a low voice full of palpable weariness and resignation.

“You are guilty of the most heinous of crimes,” the Chief Judge contradicted. "That is not open to debate. This is your final chance to make what amends you may to those whom you have harmed through your selfish, deviant act. It will have no effect on the sentencing by this Court.”

“But I have done nothing wrong,” the man emphatically repeated, the perspiration rolling down his neck deepening the growing ring of sweat absorbed by his bright orange jumper, staining a dark collar of moisture around his neck.

“Silence!” the Chief Judge hissed. “The record will show that the prisoner is unrepentant. This Court finds that the prisoner willfully, maliciously and without justification removed his neural connector with the purpose and effect of disconnecting himself from the Net. We further find that the motivating factor for this egregious, willful and repugnant crime was the attempt to abandon the Common Consciousness and establish his individuality separate and apart from the Communal Mind. We further find that the subject is in full possession of his legal faculties and capable of understanding the criminal nature of his acts, and, perhaps most tragically, that he fails to see the enormity of his crime.” The Chief Justice faltered slightly, delivering the final words of the Courts sentence with a slight tremor in his voice. After stopping a moment to compose himself as his learned colleagues looked on impassively, he continued. “It is, therefore, the judgment of this Court that you will forever remain disconnected from the nets from this day forward.”

Upon hearing the Judge’s words the prisoner’s eyes opened wider, attempting to digest their import. Could it be? Could he finally be allowed the freedom to regain his humanity? The unalienable right to be an individual for the first time in his life? The opportunity to live in a world in which he could have original thoughts, genuine emotions, and the opportunity to be different from everyone else? The joy in these words nearly made him faint with relief and unbridled joy, allowing him for the first time in his life the possibility of hope as tears welled in his eyes. He found he could not speak, could not express even the simple words “thank you” to the Court. It was as though he were emerging from a life-long nightmare, as if . . .

“The prisoner’s IP address, 999.999.999.999, shall be erased from the Nets,” the Judge continued as the prisoner’s tears flowed freely. His existence shall be forever stricken from the Collective Consciousness lest it germinate there and once again grow sedition in our midst.” The prisoner wept openly now while smiling broadly. “The death sentence for this most heinous of crimes is hereby commuted so that the prisoner may be allowed the individuality he craved for the rest of his natural life, devoid of the comfort of humanity or the distracting influences of life.”

The Chief Judge then paused and took a deep breath. “It is further ordered by this Court that the prisoner shall have his eyes, eardrums, tongue and olfactory organs surgically removed that he may not see, hear, taste, or speak with any other human being for the rest of his natural life. thereafter, he is to be remanded to a hospital where he shall be restrained to a bed and tended to by robotic life support aids. The sentence of this Court shall be carried out immediately and shall be witnessed by all Citizens of Earth as partial reparation for this most heinous of crimes against humanity.”

The prisoner’s screams lasted only a few moments as an anesthetic was administered and the cameras were re-arranged in preparation for justice to be carried out.

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Justice - from Book of Dreams 2e: Science Fiction and Speculative Fiction Short Stories (c) 2013 by Victor D. Lopez.

title: Justice

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Explain the crime that the protagonist committed and why it is so "heinous."

answer: The story implies that he removed his neural connector to disconnect himself from the nets so that he could live a normal life, away from constant uploads of other's input. It might also explain his motive for wanting to live life as an individual and not as part of the collective consciousness. He has not shown any interest in technology that aids in social connection.

text: The response misses to mention that the reason to disconnect was to attempt to abandon the common consciousness and establish his individuality separate and apart from the Communal Mind.

refinement: The story implies that he removed his neural connector to disconnect himself from the nets in an attempt to abandon the common consciousness and establish his individuality separate and apart from the Communal Mind. It might also explain his motive for wanting to live life as an individual and not as part of the collective consciousness. He has not shown any interest in technology that aids in social connection.

answer: The protagonist committed the crime of disconnecting himself from the Net, severing the connection of the Communal Consciousness. This is called deviant behavior and is considered heinous because it is the deepest betrayal of humanity and an unthinking rejection of everything held sacred. The crime is heinous because it is a deliberate and willful act committed without reason and without remorse.

answer: The protagonist is accused of removing his neural connector that links him with the rest of the population of the world. The judge believes that this act is particularly heinous because it was an attempt to establish an individuality that is separate from the "Communal Mind."

answer: The protagonist committed the heinous crime of wanting to be an individual, removed his neural connector from the Net, and attempted to abandon the Collective Consciousness. This is considered such a heinous crime because it would threaten the communal order, individuality considered a threat to the collective mindset. The punishment is to be forever disconnected from humanity, his eyes, ears, tongue and olfactory organs to be surgically removed. This is considered necessary to prevent further sedition and protect the integrity of the communal order.

answer: They've disconnected themselves from the Communal Mind, which is considered a vile thing to do since it would mean that they would no longer be able to live with other humans. He's accused of doing this out of individuality, and for this reason his sentence is being carried out.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the setting of the story.

answer: The story takes place in a world divided in to two classes: The Net and The Collective Consciousness. The prisoner who was tagged 999.999.999.999 removed his neural connector from The Net that connects all citizens of Earth. He was sentenced to be disconnected from The Net completely, have his eyes taken out, and he could no longer hear, see, taste, or speak with anyone for the rest of his life. However, before the sentence was carried out, the sentence was commuted to banishing him from The Net instead.

text: There is no evidence in the text that mentions the world is divided in two classes. There is only supposed to be the Net.

refinement: The prisoner who was tagged 999.999.999.999 removed his neural connector from The Net that connects all citizens of Earth. He was sentenced to be disconnected from The Net completely, have his eyes taken out, and he could no longer hear, see, taste, or speak with anyone for the rest of his life. However, before the sentence was carried out, the sentence was commuted to banishing him from The Net instead.

text: The response inaccurately mentions that the sentence was commuted from removing his organs, however it was commuted from the death sentence.

refinement: The prisoner who was tagged 999.999.999.999 removed his neural connector from The Net that connects all citizens of Earth. He was sentenced to be disconnected from The Net completely, have his eyes taken out, and he could no longer hear, see, taste, or speak with anyone for the rest of his life. The sentence had been commuted from the death sentence for this most heinous of crimes.

answer: The story takes place in a courtroom as the final sentencing for the last remaining capital offense is being carried out. The setting is somber and formal as the judges deliver their verdict- the prisoner is found guilty of willfully disconnecting himself from the Net with the intention of abandoning the common consciousness. The sentence has been carried out- the prisoner will have his eyes, ears, tongue, and olfactory organs surgically removed so that he cannot see, hear, taste, or speak with another human being for the rest of his natural life. Citizens of Earth are to witness the sentence being carried out.

answer: The setting of the story is a courtroom. The society in which the passage is set in is a dystopic future in which every member of the human population is hooked up to a neural network and operates on a "Communal Mind." Anything can be immediately be broadcast to any person on Earth.

answer: The story is set in an all-too-near future courtroom, in which the prisoner has been charged with the most heinous crime of willfully and maliciously separating himself from the Common Consciousness, which is what seems to dictate every action of the citizens. The prisoner has been told his punishment before the crime is revoked and he has his eyes, ears, tongue and nose removed.

text: The response includes verbiage that causes confusion. "crime is revoked" is not referenced in the text.

refinement: The story is set in an all-too-near future courtroom, in which the prisoner has been charged with the most heinous crime of willfully and maliciously separating himself from the Common Consciousness, which is what seems to dictate every action of the citizens. The prisoner has been told his punishment before he has his eyes, ears, tongue and nose removed.

answer: The story takes place in a courtroom where the last remaining capital offense has been committed and the last remaining prisoner is sentenced with surgical removal of the eyes, ears, tongue, and olfactory organs to be restrained on a hospital bed for the rest of his natural life.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Explain the twist at the end of the story.

answer: The twist at the end of the short story is that the prisoner is given a different sentence than the one planned for him—the death sentence for his crime has been commuted so that he can live the rest of his life disconnected from the communal mind. This twist is unexpected and gives the prisoner hope in a harsh judgement.

text: The response misses to mention that the twist is when the judge sentences him to have his sensory organs removed.

refinement: The twist at the end of the short story is that the prisoner is given a different sentence than the one planned for him—the death sentence for his crime has been commuted so that he can live the rest of his life disconnected from the communal mind. This unexpected twist is when the judge further orders for the prisoner's eyes, eardrums, tongue and olfactory organs surgically removed that he may not see, hear, taste, or speak with any other human being for the rest of his natural life. This ruins any chance of the protagonist being able to experience life outside of the Communal Mind.

answer: The twist is that the person the audience assumed to be the prisoner is actually the judge. This changes the whole vibe of the story and previews that "justice" will not be an unbiased, balanced judgement in this court.

text: There is no evidence in the text that suggests that the prisoner is actually the judge.

text: The response misses to explain the twist, instructed in the task.

refinement: The plot twist is that the prisoner is first sentenced to be released from the neural net and be free to become his own individual self outside of the Communal Mind. However, the judge tells the protagonist that all of his sensory organs will be removed and that he will be restrained to a bed for the remainder of his life, thereby ruining any chance of the protagonist being able to experience life outside of the Communal Mind.

answer: He is not being sentenced to disconnect from the "nets". His punishment is death. The decision to sentence him this way comes as a welcome relief to him.

text: The response inaccurately mentions that the prisoner's eventual punishment is death.

refinement: He is not being sentenced to disconnect from the "nets". The decision to sentence him this way comes as a welcome relief to him.

text: The response misses to mention the twist in the sentencing.

refinement: He is not being sentenced to disconnect from the "nets". The decision to sentence him this way comes as a welcome relief to him. However, the judge tells the protagonist that all of his sensory organs will be removed and that he will be restrained to a bed for the remainder of his life, thereby ruining any chance of the protagonist being able to experience life outside of the Communal Mind.

answer: At the end of the story, the prisoner is sentenced to have his senses removed, live in a hospital and be denied interaction with other humans for the rest of his natural life. This twist is surprising, as the prisoner was initially believed to have been sentenced for a crime. However, it turns out the sentence was actually meant as a form of reparation and redemption, a punishment that is actually a gift in disguise.

text: The response misses to specify that the twist is surprising was originally sentenced to be released from the neural net and be free to become his own individual self outside of the Communal Mind

refinement: At the end of the story, the prisoner is sentenced to have his senses removed, live in a hospital and be denied interaction with other humans for the rest of his natural life. This twist is surprising, as the prisoner was initially believed to have been sentenced by being released from the neural net and be free to become his own individual self outside of the Communal Mind.

answer: As the judge speaks, protagonist believes that he will be released from the neural net and be free to become his own individual self outside of the Communal Mind. However, the judge tells the protagonist that all of his sensory organs will be removed and that he will be restrained to a bed for the remainder of his life, thereby ruining any chance of the protagonist being able to experience life outside of the Communal Mind.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the negative events of the story.

answer: The prisoner is found guilty of willfully disconnecting himself from the collective conscious, and as punishment his eyes, ears, tongue, and olfactory organs are surgically removed so that he can never see, hear, taste, or speak with other human beings again. The sentence is to be carried out at once and is witnessed by all citizens of Earth.

answer: The protagonist is found guilty of a crime against humanity. The court also orders that the protagonist's sensory organs be removed. He will then be confined to a hospital bed for the remainder of his life.

answer: The prisoner's IP will be erased and his identity will be forever wiped from the net. He will have his eyes, ears and organs surgically removed. He will be held in a bed of a hospital like this forever.

answer: In the near future, a prisoner is found guilty of willfully disconnecting himself from the Collective Consciousness - abandoning the Net so that he could have individuality. The Court sentences the prisoner to lifelong disconnection from humanity, removal of his sensory organs, and confinement to a hospital bed. Justice is carried out violently, with screams and tears.

answer: The prisoner's eyes, eardrums, and other senses are surgically removed so that he will never again see, hear, taste, or speak with another human being in his life.


text: She stood lifeless next to the wall at the end of the darkened musty corridor, blood still dripping off of her hand where it had run down her arm from her shoulder.  She slowly starts to peak around the edge of the wall when a loud **SHRIEK!** echoes terribly off the moldy ceramic walls. Quickly she jerks her head back in fear of being spotted.  Cautiously dropping to her knees and now down on all fours she tries to look again.  The long hall is slightly misty from the broken windows and the adjacent forest next to the abandon hospital. About halfway down the passageway, broken beams of moonlight fall upon the blood soaked floors from the previous victims who were brought here that tried to escape. At the far end it appears very deep and dark….her hopes are set on the stairwell that is mirrored to the one she just came from, hoping desperately that it is unobstructed.  Minutes pass without as much as a sound from anywhere.  The silence is very thick and weighs heavily upon her eardrums.  She decides that the time is now! Slowly she starts to stand back up as her knees and ankles crack like twigs.  Waiting again for a few more minutes so she doesn’t stir up attention. She begins her trip down the hall, staying close to the walls and underneath the windows of the rooms in the ward.  Peeking around the corners of the open doors where the moonlight shines in to making sure the coast is clear and continues to press on. She is more than halfway down the hall now and is coming into the darkest part when she hears movement from behind her…she quickly turns her head to see a zombie flying out of one of the rooms and in full stride, hungry for the scent of fresh blood dripping from her wounds.  She runs as hard and as fast as she can into the pure darkness, hands in front of her reaching out to slam in the handle of the stairwell door when she reaches it.  “Wham” the door flings open in a *whoosh* and jerks her in with it, losing her balance but only for a moment. She turns and slams the door back closed, just in time to hear the dreadful zombie behind her slam head first into the heavy steel door.  *Sigh* she breathes a full chest of air in relief. *“I made it, I made it” * …... **“SHRIEK!”** she spins around just in time to see the putrid mouth of another Zombie lurching at her thin frail neck, as into tears her flesh and veins. Her head is severed off and lays into a pool of her own blood.  Her eyes still processing the horrific scene to her brain of the zombie feasting on her fresh corpse.

title: Abandoned

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who is "she"?

answer: The text doesn't indicate the character's gender.

text: The text does indicate the character's gender, just not her name.

refinement: The text doesn't indicate the character's name.

answer: It's never explained fully, but she is running away from zombies.

text: "She is more than halfway down the hall now and is coming into the darkest part when she hears movement from behind her…she quickly turns her head to see a zombie" is evidence that she was trying to escape zombies.

answer: The character is referred to as "she". The character is at the end of a long, dark, musty corridor in an abandoned hospital and begins to walk down it when a zombie greets her. She tries to get away but is unsuccessful. The zombie decapitates her, ending her life.

text: This does not directly answer the question.

refinement: The character is referred to as "she" and is not named throughout the story. The character is at the end of a long, dark, musty corridor in an abandoned hospital and begins to walk down it when a zombie greets her. She tries to get away but is unsuccessful. The zombie decapitates her, ending her life.

text: "She is more than halfway down the hall now and is coming into the darkest part when she hears movement from behind her…she quickly turns her head to see a zombie" is evidence that she was trying to escape zombies.

answer: The "she" in the passage is the protagonist, a lone survivor trying to escape a zombie horde.

text: "She is more than halfway down the hall now and is coming into the darkest part when she hears movement from behind her…she quickly turns her head to see a zombie" is evidence that she was trying to escape zombies.

answer: That information can't be found

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Describe the source of the shriek.

answer: It's an inhuman scream not belonging to a human.

text: The text could specify that it belongs to a zombie.

refinement: It's an inhuman scream not belonging to a human (a zombie).

answer: It seems the shrieks are coming from the zombies.

text: "She is more than halfway down the hall now and is coming into the darkest part when she hears movement from behind her…she quickly turns her head to see a zombie" is evidence that the shriek was coming from zombies.

answer: The source of the shriek couldn't be determined from the text.

text: The source of the shriek could be determined from the text. It was from a zombie.

refinement: The source of the shriek was from a zombie.

answer: The shriek came from a zombie following a trail of blood. The zombie heard the victim and began to pursue her.

text: "She is more than halfway down the hall now and is coming into the darkest part when she hears movement from behind her…she quickly turns her head to see a zombie" is evidence that the shriek was coming from zombies.

answer: The shriek originated from a zombie in pursuit of the main character. This zombie likely reached the character by emerging from a room in the abandoned hospital. The shriek is a horrifying sound signaling the start of the character's demise.

text: "She is more than halfway down the hall now and is coming into the darkest part when she hears movement from behind her…she quickly turns her head to see a zombie" is evidence that the shriek was coming from zombies.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What were the "previous victims" victims of?

answer: The previous victims were victims of zombies.

text: "she quickly turns her head to see a zombie flying out of one of the rooms and in full stride" implies the previous victims were victims that could have possibly been turned into zombies.

answer: Presumably, they were bitten by zombies and possibly turned into zombies themselves.

text: "she quickly turns her head to see a zombie flying out of one of the rooms and in full stride" implies the previous victims were victims that could have possibly been turned into zombies.

answer: The "previous victims" were victims of zombies who attacked them in the long hall at the abandoned hospital.

text: "she quickly turns her head to see a zombie flying out of one of the rooms and in full stride" implies the previous victims were victims that could have possibly been turned into zombies.

answer: Eaten by the same zombies?

text: The answer is unsure.

text: Incomplete sentence.

refinement: The previous victims referred to were victims possibly eaten by the same zombies.

answer: They seem to be victims of the zombies that reside in this building.

text: "she quickly turns her head to see a zombie flying out of one of the rooms and in full stride" implies the previous victims were victims that could have possibly been turned into zombies.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How does the story end?

answer: She is attacked by another zombie and is already dead when her eyes still process the gruesome scene

text: "she spins around just in time to see the putrid mouth of another Zombie lurching at her thin frail neck, as into tears her flesh and veins. Her head is severed off and lays into a pool of her own blood. Her eyes still processing the horrific scene to her brain of the zombie feasting on her fresh corpse." is evidence that she died by the end of the story.

answer: The story ends with the protagonist being killed by a zombie head-on.

text: "she spins around just in time to see the putrid mouth of another Zombie lurching at her thin frail neck, as into tears her flesh and veins. Her head is severed off and lays into a pool of her own blood. Her eyes still processing the horrific scene to her brain of the zombie feasting on her fresh corpse." is evidence that she died by the end of the story.

answer: The protagonist is killed by one of the zombies and her body is ravaged by the creature.

text: "she spins around just in time to see the putrid mouth of another Zombie lurching at her thin frail neck, as into tears her flesh and veins. Her head is severed off and lays into a pool of her own blood. Her eyes still processing the horrific scene to her brain of the zombie feasting on her fresh corpse." is evidence that she died by the end of the story.

answer: The protagonist loses control, gets bit on the neck and then eaten.

text: The answer does not specify what the protagonist lost control of. This part of the answer can just be removed.

refinement: The protagonist gets bit on the neck and then eaten.

text: "she spins around just in time to see the putrid mouth of another Zombie lurching at her thin frail neck, as into tears her flesh and veins. Her head is severed off and lays into a pool of her own blood. Her eyes still processing the horrific scene to her brain of the zombie feasting on her fresh corpse." is evidence that she died by the end of the story.

answer: The female protagonist is brutally killed and eaten by a zombie.

text: "she spins around just in time to see the putrid mouth of another Zombie lurching at her thin frail neck, as into tears her flesh and veins. Her head is severed off and lays into a pool of her own blood. Her eyes still processing the horrific scene to her brain of the zombie feasting on her fresh corpse." is evidence that she died by the end of the story.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: A female character runs through a dark hospital hallway being chased by zombies. Two creatures are coming right for her when she reaches the stairwell door and slams it shut. While she lets out a sigh of relief, one of the creatures flies into the door, head first. The second one then latches onto the woman's throat and kills her.

answer: The female protagonist tries to make her way through passageways and corridors to escape the zombies. She notices blood-soaked floors from the previous victims who had been brought there. She escapes a zombie when she is jerked through a steel door. As she breathes a sigh of relief, a zombie brutally kills and eats her.

answer: Taking shelter in a derelict hospital, a girl heading for a stairwell carefully takes her first step. She takes more steps heading - and is attacked from behind by a zombie. Running as fast as she can, she tries to escape, but can't. The zombie catches up with her and takes her life right there.

answer: A girl stands motionless at the end of a dark corridor in an abandoned hospital. She hears a scream from behind her and turns to see a zombie approaching. She runs into the stairwell, slamming the door shut behind her before the zombie can get to her. The zombie slams its head into the door, but is too late to catch the girl. The girl's head is ripped off and devoured soon after; her eyes process the horrific scene before her brain shuts down.

text: This is not a four-sentence summary.

refinement: A girl stands motionless at the end of a dark corridor in an abandoned hospital. She runs into the stairwell, slamming the door shut behind her before the zombie can get to her. The zombie slams its head into the door, but is too late to catch the girl. The girl's head is ripped off and devoured soon after; her eyes process the horrific scene before her brain shuts down.

answer: A woman is trapped in an abandoned hospital corridor by zombies which she sees through the broken windows. When one catches her scent, she flees towards the stairwell door and manages to slam it shut just in time. She is mortally wounded by another zombie, her head is severed off, and she dies in a pool of her own blood.

text: This is not a four-sentence summary.

refinement: A woman is trapped in an abandoned hospital corridor by zombies which she sees through the broken windows. When one catches her scent, she flees towards the stairwell door and manages to slam it shut just in time. She breathes a sigh of relief but is shocked when she realizes another zombie is after her. She is mortally wounded by the zombie, her head is severed off, and she dies in a pool of her own blood.