text:
The first thing you do is butter the bun. Then you drop it down the toaster. The toaster takes approximately eighteen seconds to toast. You then put the top and bottom together, place them on a red tray and then cover the twelve buns that fit on the tray, 4x3,  with another tray and place them to the side. Once you are ready to make the sandwich you place two pickles on the bottom, no more than a quarter inch over lapping. Then you place the chicken filet with the smooth, round side facing up and then place the crown of the bun on top. Finally open up the sandwich bag allowing enough room for the sandwich to easily slide in, then fold the bag over twice and place it in the warming drawer for five minutes. Any sandwich that sits there for longer than five minutes gets trashed. If you would like a deluxe sandwich then place either a slice of American, provolone, or pepper jack cheese on top of the filet, then put two, whole, tomato slices on top of the cheese and two pieces of lettuce, shiny side up, that frame the bun on top of the tomatoes. Then repeat until your soul has been crushed, pissed on, and every dream and fire that has ever existed in you has been stomped out by the ceaseless, monotonous work you subject yourself to in order to not even get by.

They, being the people who don’t work with you, will remind you that you chose to be there, just be thankful to have a job, or that it is just temporary. You know that isn’t true though. You can’t find a better job because you are working 50 hours a week and you are too tired to do anything else. You can barely even find the energy or will power to get out of bed in the morning. Every once in a while you feel like you have enough energy and fortitude to say enough is enough and move on but then you realize your life revolves around this job. All of your friends are there. They are the people that deal with all of the shitty customers who think they are the Queen of god damn England, the ones who think they own you because you stand behind a register. Your coworkers are the ones that after all the shit you put up with tell to forget the customer, he is an asshole, you didn’t do anything wrong, people like that just happen. You have a bond with your coworkers, like brother in arms who are united by their common misery. So the cycle repeats, week after week after week after week after week after week as if your days are manufactured on an assembly line.

Then you find yourself waking up in the tiny room you call an apartment. You shower and head to work and start your day off like you have the past, seemingly, five thousand days. You clock in, take your slip that shows the time you clocked in and put it your wallet. Then you say high to everyone. Then you either go to the kitchen or the front counter depending on what you are assigned that day. Then you spend the next ten hours slaving away like the robot you are. You listen to the exact same orders, make the exact same food and you have the exact same routine to live by. Then you watch your boss drive up in his new, gas guzzling behemoth of a truck and say “Hi!” to everyone as if he wouldn’t want to be anywhere else in the world. It is as if he has no idea what the people he employs put up with on a daily basis. It is as if he hopes his friendly disposition will be contagious but what does he do besides sit in that office of his in the back while you are the one who gets burned at the fryers and the one who has to choose if it is worth turning the heat on at night. You are the one that has to decide whether or not to fix your car or just walk the five miles or so. The one who should just deal with the tooth ache or dish out the three thousand dollars for a root canal because god forbid giving his employees health insurance would just decimate his profits. No one likes the boss.

Between the shitty boss, shitty job, and shitty house and lifestyle what can you find to be joyous about? You are simply a tiny little speck. In fact you aren’t even speck in the scheme of things. You are less than a pixel, you are less than even the red, blue, and green lights that make up a pixel. You are nonexistent and utterly replaceable and no one will notice if you go. Just like no one has noticed the billions of stars that have existed and perished and no one ever will. Just like no one ever notices the trillions of bacteria that are beneath our feet. That is what you amount to. At some point we have all been there. The thing is though that not all of us end there. That is the saving grace. There is a glimmer of a hope that one day you can escape the cycle of the daily grind. Get a degree if you are young enough, have a support system while you find a better job, or maybe you are stronger than most and do it all alone.

Not everyone is lucky though. Sometimes the grind wears you down and grinds you to you are so thin that you become a part of the walls there. You are an everlasting stone that will be a part of where you are stuck, just like the walls. Bills add up and sooner than you know it you are living out on the streets and left with nothing but free time. Maybe you cope with a steady dose of drugs. Maybe you cope with a healthier method. Either way it leads to the same thing. If you aren’t apart of the club, the haves, then you better get used to meaningless, mindless tasks that ask nothing of you but obedience.  The boss, the haves, will tell you that working at these crummy soul devouring jobs is fine. What would they know about what you do though? It is not a matter of them being any less hard working but it is a matter of having something to show for it. If you work at a restaurant and you can’t even afford to eat there they pay you so little then what is the point?

It gets to the point where thinking physically hurts. It breaks you just as bad as your job does. You think of all the things that you gave up, that you let slip by and you think never again will I let that happen, but it is too late. You have already buttered the buns. You have dropped them in the toaster. You have placed them on the tray. Put the two pickles on the bun, then the filet, and then the top part of the bun. You have wrapped the sandwich and placed it in the warming drawer until you throw it up for the next customer to devour or for it to get thrown away because it has been the warmer to long and has grown hard and unpleasant and unwanted.

title: A Man's Thoughts on Never Getting His Slice of the Pie in a Southern Town with Nothing Left to Live For.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why can't the protagonist leave?

answer: He is stuck in the poverty trap. He can't afford to save money, and his earnings are barely enough to scrape by. He is too tired to look for another job even without leaving his current one. Lastly, his only friends are his coworkers.

text: Too tired: "You can’t find a better job because you are working 50 hours a week and you are too tired to do anything else."

text: Friends: "Every once in a while you feel like you have enough energy and fortitude to say enough is enough and move on but then you realize your life revolves around this job. All of your friends are there."

text: Barely scraping by: "Then repeat until your soul has been crushed, pissed on, and every dream and fire that has ever existed in you has been stomped out by the ceaseless, monotonous work you subject yourself to in order to not even get by."

answer: Although the job he has is really hard to get better, all of his friends work there, he can barely find the energy to get out of bed every day, spending all his time there, and he has a shitty boss, it could be a financial problem.

text: There's no reason to guess, as the mentioned problems are enough to trap someone.

refinement: All of his friends work there, he can barely find the energy to get out of bed every day, spending all his time there, and he has a shitty boss; there seems to be a financial problem too.

text: Friends: "Every once in a while you feel like you have enough energy and fortitude to say enough is enough and move on but then you realize your life revolves around this job. All of your friends are there."

text: Too tired: "You can’t find a better job because you are working 50 hours a week and you are too tired to do anything else."

text: Shitty boss: "... god forbid giving his employees health insurance would just decimate his profits. No one likes the boss."

answer: The protagonist cannot leave because they depend on the job for income and nothing else in their life fulfills them. They also feel a sense of comfort in the friendships they formed with their coworkers. At the same time, the job is tiring and the work is monotonous. The thought of leaving feels daunting and the reality is that they don't feel good enough to do something better. Finally, they are defeated by the corporate structure of their job - they work for a boss who has more power than they do and makes more money than they do while he bothers to smile and say hello. The protagonist worries that they will just be forgotten by the world.

text: It's not the case that the narrator doesn't feel good enough to do something better; he's just stuck.

refinement: The protagonist cannot leave because they depend on the job for income and nothing else in their life fulfills them. They also feel a sense of comfort in the friendships they formed with their coworkers. At the same time, the job is tiring and the work is monotonous. The thought of leaving feels daunting and the reality is that they are stuck where they are. Finally, they are defeated by the corporate structure of their job - they work for a boss who has more power than they do and makes more money than they do while he bothers to smile and say hello. The protagonist worries that they will just be forgotten by the world.

text: The part starting with "Finally..." is made up. It's somewhat similar in tone but the content is misleading.

refinement: The protagonist cannot leave because they depend on the job for income and nothing else in their life fulfills them. They also feel a sense of comfort in the friendships they formed with their coworkers. At the same time, the job is tiring and the work is monotonous. The thought of leaving feels daunting and the reality is that they are stuck where they are.

text: Friends: "Every once in a while you feel like you have enough energy and fortitude to say enough is enough and move on but then you realize your life revolves around this job. All of your friends are there."

text: Monotony: "So the cycle repeats, week after week after week after week after week after week as if your days are manufactured on an assembly line."

answer: He's overworked and has nothing else to do except work. His friends are there. They are the only friends he has, and he likes working there. He also doesn't have the energy.

text: The narrator clearly doesn't like working there. Here's a snippet showing the narrator's negative opinion of their work: "Then repeat until your soul has been crushed, pissed on, and every dream and fire that has ever existed in you has been stomped out by the ceaseless, monotonous work you subject yourself to in order to not even get by."

refinement: He's overworked and has nothing else to do except work. His friends are there. They are the only friends he has. He also doesn't have the energy.

text: Friends: "Every once in a while you feel like you have enough energy and fortitude to say enough is enough and move on but then you realize your life revolves around this job. All of your friends are there."

text: No energy: "You can’t find a better job because you are working 50 hours a week and you are too tired to do anything else."

answer: The protagonist cannot leave because they are financially strained and have no other good options. There is also a bond with their coworkers which makes it hard to just walk away. Finally, after all the hard work they put into their job the payoffs are meager. This lead to feelings of worthlessness and inertia. The protagonist just wants to find something better to do so they can be happy but they can't accomplish this feat alone.

text: The sentence starting "Finally..." reads weird, as if it implies something positive, which it doesn't.

refinement: The protagonist cannot leave because they are financially strained and have no other good options. There is also a bond with their coworkers which makes it hard to just walk away. Also, after all the hard work they put into their job the payoffs are meager. This lead to feelings of worthlessness and inertia. The protagonist just wants to find something better to do so they can be happy but they can't accomplish this feat alone.

text: There are minor grammar mistakes. Missing comma after "...into their job" and "This lead[s]". Another missing comma before "...but they".

refinement: The protagonist cannot leave because they are financially strained and have no other good options. There is also a bond with their coworkers which makes it hard to just walk away. Also, after all the hard work they put into their job, the payoffs are meager. This leads to feelings of worthlessness and inertia. The protagonist just wants to find something better to do so they can be happy, but they can't accomplish this feat alone.

text: Friends: "Every once in a while you feel like you have enough energy and fortitude to say enough is enough and move on but then you realize your life revolves around this job. All of your friends are there."

text: No energy: "You can’t find a better job because you are working 50 hours a week and you are too tired to do anything else."

text: Financially strained: "Then repeat until your soul has been crushed, pissed on, and every dream and fire that has ever existed in you has been stomped out by the ceaseless, monotonous work you subject yourself to in order to not even get by."

text: Feeling worthless: "Between the shitty boss, shitty job, and shitty house and lifestyle what can you find to be joyous about? You are simply a tiny little speck."

text: Can't do it alone: "Get a degree if you are young enough, have a support system while you find a better job, or maybe you are stronger than most and do it all alone."

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why don't the workers like the boss?

answer: The workers don't like the boss because he doesn't seem to realize how hard they work or that the jobs they perform are less than ideal. The boss remains relatively uninvolved and comfortable in his position while the workers are stuck performing daily tasks that they are not compensated enough for. This leads to a general resentment for the boss.

text: The answer can also mention the lack of health care.

refinement: The workers don't like the boss because he doesn't seem to realize how hard they work or that the jobs they perform are less than ideal. The boss remains relatively uninvolved and comfortable in his position while the workers are stuck performing daily tasks that they are not compensated enough for. They also don't get healthcare. This leads to a general resentment for the boss.

text: Unrelatable boss: "Then you watch your boss drive up in his new, gas guzzling behemoth of a truck and say “Hi!” to everyone as if he wouldn’t want to be anywhere else in the world. It is as if he has no idea what the people he employs put up with on a daily basis."

text: Dismal pay: "You are the one that has to decide whether or not to fix your car or just walk the five miles or so. The one who should just deal with the tooth ache or dish out the three thousand dollars for a root canal because god forbid giving his employees health insurance would just decimate his profits."

text: General resentment: "No one likes the boss."

answer: The workers do not like the boss because he expects them to work long hours and does not pay them enough for the work they do, while he himself is never around. Additionally the boss asks nothing of the "haves" and his friendly attitudes mean nothing, as he is unaware of the struggles of the workers. The workers feel that the boss lacks any understanding of what they go through.

text: The boss is around often enough. The story doesn't say anything about him not being in the office.

refinement: The workers do not like the boss because he expects them to work long hours and does not pay them enough for the work they do. Additionally the boss asks nothing of the "haves" and his friendly attitudes mean nothing, as he is unaware of the struggles of the workers. The workers feel that the boss lacks any understanding of what they go through.

text: Asking nothing of the "haves" is not a complaint raised by the narrator.

refinement: The workers do not like the boss because he expects them to work long hours and does not pay them enough for the work they do. His friendly attitudes mean nothing, as he is unaware of the struggles of the workers. The workers feel that the boss lacks any understanding of what they go through.

text: All sentences feel like they are harping on the same tune. The last one can be omitted.

refinement: The workers do not like the boss because he expects them to work long hours and does not pay them enough for the work they do. His friendly attitudes mean nothing, as he is unaware of the struggles of the workers.

text: The answer can also mention the lack of healthcare.

refinement: The workers do not like the boss because he expects them to work long hours and does not pay them enough for the work they do. His friendly attitudes mean nothing, as he is unaware of the struggles of the workers. Finally, the workers don't even get healthcare.

text: Unrelatable boss: "Then you watch your boss drive up in his new, gas guzzling behemoth of a truck and say “Hi!” to everyone as if he wouldn’t want to be anywhere else in the world. It is as if he has no idea what the people he employs put up with on a daily basis."

text: Dismal pay: "You are the one that has to decide whether or not to fix your car or just walk the five miles or so. The one who should just deal with the tooth ache or dish out the three thousand dollars for a root canal because god forbid giving his employees health insurance would just decimate his profits."

text: General resentment: "No one likes the boss."

answer: The boss who pays the employees very little

text: The sentence is constructed weirdly. "The boss who pays" is the culprit. Also, there should be a period at the end.

refinement: The boss pays the employees very little.

text: There are other complaints mentioned by the narrator. One of them is the lack of healthcare.

refinement: The boss pays the employees very little. The workers don't get healthcare.

text: The boss is very unrelatable, which deserves a mention.

refinement: The boss pays the employees very little. The workers don't get healthcare. Finally, the boss has almost no redeeming qualities as he doesn't understand how hard his worker's lives are.

text: Very little pay: "You are the one that has to decide whether or not to fix your car or just walk the five miles or so. The one who should just deal with the tooth ache or dish out the three thousand dollars for a root canal because god forbid giving his employees health insurance would just decimate his profits."

answer: It is not made clear whether the workers have reasons to dislike the boss or not. It is obvious that the boss' good natured attitude does not translate to better conditions for the workers.

text: The answer is completely wrong. There are various complaints about the boss. The answer should be rewritten.

refinement: The workers don't like the boss because he doesn't seem to realize how hard they work or that the jobs they perform are less than ideal. The boss remains relatively uninvolved and comfortable in his position while the workers are stuck performing daily tasks that they are not compensated enough for. They also don't get healthcare. This leads to a general resentment for the boss.

answer: The boss pays them as little as he can, is completely oblivious to their plight, and still has the gall to act as if his jovial attitude should be contagious.

text: There's also the lack of healthcare that adds to the resentment toward the boss.

refinement: The boss pays them as little as he can, is completely oblivious to their plight, and still has the gall to act as if his jovial attitude should be contagious. Finally, the workers don't even get healthcare.

text: Very little pay: "You are the one that has to decide whether or not to fix your car or just walk the five miles or so. The one who should just deal with the tooth ache or dish out the three thousand dollars for a root canal because god forbid giving his employees health insurance would just decimate his profits."

text: Unrelatable boss: "Then you watch your boss drive up in his new, gas guzzling behemoth of a truck and say “Hi!” to everyone as if he wouldn’t want to be anywhere else in the world. It is as if he has no idea what the people he employs put up with on a daily basis."

text: Boss expects contagious attitude: "It is as if he hopes his friendly disposition will be contagious"

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What is the central complaint in the story?

answer: The narrator feels stuck in a mundane job.

text: While the narrator is definitely stuck, the core of his plight is that he has nothing left to live for.

refinement: The narrator feels stuck in a mundane job. With so few prospects, there isn't much left to live for.

text: Stuck: "So the cycle repeats, week after week after week after week after week after week as if your days are manufactured on an assembly line."

answer: All I have is a job and an apartment.

text: The answer is made up and frivilous. It should be rewritten.

refinement: The narrator has few prospects available and no way to improve their life. He's stuck in poverty and a crappy job with nothing left to live for.

answer: The central complaint in the story is that the protagonist feels trapped in an exhausting, tedious job with no foreseeable future. The job is severely disappointing, with no sense of reward and little sense of purpose. The protagonist feels invisible and replaceable in the world.

text: Tedious: "So the cycle repeats, week after week after week after week after week after week as if your days are manufactured on an assembly line."

text: Unrewarding job: "Then repeat until your soul has been crushed, pissed on, and every dream and fire that has ever existed in you has been stomped out by the ceaseless, monotonous work you subject yourself to in order to not even get by."

text: Insignificant and replaceable: "You are simply a tiny little speck. In fact you aren’t even speck in the scheme of things. You are less than a pixel, you are less than even the red, blue, and green lights that make up a pixel. You are nonexistent and utterly replaceable and no one will notice if you go."

answer: The narrator doesn't mind working hard, but it bothers him heavily that he can't afford to eat at the place he works. He doesn't have anything to show for his hard work.

text: The main struggle of the narrator is the state of being stuck in a crappy life and having nothing to live for. The answer misses this.

refinement: The narrator doesn't mind working hard, but it bothers him heavily that he can't afford to eat at the place he works. He doesn't have anything to show for his hard work. He feels stuck and unable to improve, and he feels like there's nothing to live for.

text: Can't afford the place he works at: "If you work at a restaurant and you can’t even afford to eat there they pay you so little then what is the point?"

text: Nothing to show for hard work: "It is not a matter of them being any less hard working but it is a matter of having something to show for it."

answer: The central complaint in the story is that the protagonist is tired of a monotonous dead-end job that offers little to no satisfaction. He is stuck in a repetitive cycle that he does not derive any pleasure from and is devalued by those around him.

text: The narrator doesn't say anything like feeling devalued by those around him. In fact, his coworkers are one of the few reasons he has of going on.

refinement: The central complaint in the story is that the protagonist is tired of a monotonous dead-end job that offers little to no satisfaction. He is stuck in a repetitive cycle that he does not derive any pleasure from.

text: The answer can explicitly state that the narrator feels like there's nothing left to live for.

refinement: The central complaint in the story is that the protagonist is tired of a monotonous dead-end job that offers little to no satisfaction. He is stuck in a repetitive cycle that he does not derive any pleasure from. He feels like there's nothing left to live for.

text: Monotony: "So the cycle repeats, week after week after week after week after week after week as if your days are manufactured on an assembly line."

text: No joy: "Then repeat until your soul has been crushed, pissed on, and every dream and fire that has ever existed in you has been stomped out by the ceaseless, monotonous work you subject yourself to in order to not even get by."

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why does the narrator think he's worthless?

answer: Because he's a replaceable employee who doesn't have any special skills or special connections. He is easily replaceable, and everyone he works with thinks he's a loser.

text: The people around the narrator don't think he's a loser, that part is completely made up.

refinement: Because he's a replaceable employee who doesn't have any special skills or special connections. He is easily replaceable.

text: Replaceable: "You are nonexistent and utterly replaceable and no one will notice if you go."

answer: The narrator feels worthless because his life lacks meaning in his eyes. He feels stuck in a monotonous job that doesn't provide him with enough money to keep afloat and he lacks any sort of support system to help him break out of this cycle. It leads him to view himself as a tiny pixel that nobody would notice if he were gone. This leads him to feel worthless and powerless.

text: Monotonous job and not enough pay: "Then repeat until your soul has been crushed, pissed on, and every dream and fire that has ever existed in you has been stomped out by the ceaseless, monotonous work you subject yourself to in order to not even get by."

text: Not enough support: "Get a degree if you are young enough, have a support system while you find a better job, or maybe you are stronger than most and do it all alone."

text: Tiny replaceable pixel: "You are simply a tiny little speck. In fact you aren’t even speck in the scheme of things. You are less than a pixel, you are less than even the red, blue, and green lights that make up a pixel. You are nonexistent and utterly replaceable and no one will notice if you go."

answer: The narrator feels that he is worthless because he is stuck in a repetitive and meaningless job with no foreseeable end in sight. Due to the fact that his work provides him with very little or no self-actualization or pleasure, the narrator feels unimportant in the grand scheme of things. He sees himself as replaceable and nothing more than the red, blue, and green pixels that make up an image. Because of this, the narrator feels that there is little reason for him to keep going.

text: Monotonous job and not enough pay: "Then repeat until your soul has been crushed, pissed on, and every dream and fire that has ever existed in you has been stomped out by the ceaseless, monotonous work you subject yourself to in order to not even get by."

text: Tiny replaceable pixel: "You are simply a tiny little speck. In fact you aren’t even speck in the scheme of things. You are less than a pixel, you are less than even the red, blue, and green lights that make up a pixel. You are nonexistent and utterly replaceable and no one will notice if you go."

answer: Because he does not believe his input is valued.

text: The answer completely diminishes the plethora of complaints the narrator has. It needs to be rewritten.

refinement: The narrator feels worthless because his life lacks meaning in his eyes. He feels stuck in a monotonous job that doesn't provide him with enough money to keep afloat and he lacks any sort of support system to help him break out of this cycle. It leads him to view himself as a tiny pixel that nobody would notice if he were gone. This leads him to feel worthless and powerless.

answer: Because he knows he can be replaced without any issue to the business or the boss. He has nothing to show for his work apart from his survival.

text: Replaceable: "You are nonexistent and utterly replaceable and no one will notice if you go."

text: Nothing to show for his work: "If you work at a restaurant and you can’t even afford to eat there they pay you so little then what is the point?"

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Besides being stuck, why does the narrator continue the cycle?

answer: Because they can't afford to change their methods.

text: Another major reason for the narrator being stuck is that he has no energy.

refinement: Because they can't afford to change their methods, have no energy left to pursue options.

text: There's another major reason for the narrator being stuck, which is that all his friends are his coworkers.

refinement: Because they can't afford to change their methods, have no energy left to pursue options, and their only friends are their coworkers.

text: Can't afford: "If you work at a restaurant and you can’t even afford to eat there they pay you so little then what is the point?"

answer: The narrator continues the cycle because there is nothing else for him to do. He is stuck in his job, his apartment, and his town. He has no better options and being miserable seems preferable to being homeless, alone, and having nothing else to fill the time.

text: The answer repeats the narrator beings stuck and makes up some other details that are plausible but not mentioned in the story. It should be scrapped.

text: There's no answer.

refinement: Because they can't afford to change their methods, have no energy left to pursue options, and their only friends are their coworkers.

answer: The narrator continues the cycle because he feels trapped with no good options. He is stuck at this miserable job with no money, friends, or other options for employment. Without the job, he doesn't know what would happen or where he would go. The daily grind is all he knows and he worries that anything better is out of reach or unattainable. In spite of that bleak outlook, he hopes that one day he will be able to get out and escape the cycle.

text: The answer repeats the narrator beings stuck and makes up some other details that are plausible but not mentioned in the story. It should be scrapped.

text: There's no answer.

refinement: Because they can't afford to change their methods, have no energy left to pursue options, and their only friends are their coworkers.

answer: The narrator has a bond with coworkers who experience the same misery.

text: Another major reason for the narrator being stuck is that he has no energy.

refinement: The narrator has a bond with coworkers who experience the same misery and has no energy to pursue options.

text: One more reason is that the narrator can't afford to have options.

refinement: The narrator has a bond with coworkers who experience the same misery and has no energy to pursue options. Finally, the narrator can't afford to take risks or pursue options.

text: Friends: "Every once in a while you feel like you have enough energy and fortitude to say enough is enough and move on but then you realize your life revolves around this job. All of your friends are there."

answer: The story implies that there's a tiny glimmer of hope that one day he can escape it. It's also implied that the daily grind became a habit.

text: The answer doesn't really address the question while making things up (daily grind becoming a habit as the reason for being stuck). It should be scrapped.

text: There's no answer.

refinement: Because they can't afford to change their methods, have no energy left to pursue options, and their only friends are their coworkers.

question: Write a ~5 sentence summary.

answer: The narrator, a man in his 30s, is complaining about his job at a restaurant. He hates the fact that his boss doesn't seem to care that his employees have to work under tough conditions. He has a series of mundane tasks to complete on a daily basis. He sees the irony in this resulting in his happiness, not in his pay. He complains about not getting a salary matching his level of education. He was hoping to get something more intellectually stimulating in his career field.

text: Most of the answer is made up. It should be scrapped.

text: There's no answer.

refinement: The narrator is stuck at his mundane and monotonous job. The lack of pay and time means that he can't pursue other career options. Even if he could, his only friends are his coworkers. The narrator feels stuck and can't figure out a reason to live. He tries not to think too much while going through the motions.

answer: The narrator describes how to assemble a good sandwich as part of his workday, noting the repetition. He earns so little and works so hard that looking for something better isn't possible. Even if it was, his coworkers are the only friends that make life bearable. The boss acts as if his jovial attitude is a great thing, but he has no idea what his workers go through every day. The narrator thinks of stopping the cycle, but he already made the sandwich for the next customer.

text: How to make a sandwich: "The first thing you do is butter the bun. Then you drop it down the toaster. The toaster takes approximately eighteen seconds to toast. You then put the top and bottom together, place them on a red tray and then cover the twelve buns that fit on the tray, 4x3, with another tray and place them to the side. Once you are ready to make the sandwich you place two pickles on the bottom, no more than a quarter inch over lapping. Then you place the chicken filet with the smooth, round side facing up and then place the crown of the bun on top. Finally open up the sandwich bag allowing enough room for the sandwich to easily slide in, then fold the bag over twice and place it in the warming drawer for five minutes."

text: Can't pursue other options: "You can’t find a better job because you are working 50 hours a week and you are too tired to do anything else. You can barely even find the energy or will power to get out of bed in the morning. Every once in a while you feel like you have enough energy and fortitude to say enough is enough and move on but then you realize your life revolves around this job. All of your friends are there."

text: Unrelateable boss: "Then you watch your boss drive up in his new, gas guzzling behemoth of a truck and say “Hi!” to everyone as if he wouldn’t want to be anywhere else in the world. It is as if he has no idea what the people he employs put up with on a daily basis. It is as if he hopes his friendly disposition will be contagious..."

text: The cycle goes on: "You think of all the things that you gave up, that you let slip by and you think never again will I let that happen, but it is too late. You have already buttered the buns. You have dropped them in the toaster. You have placed them on the tray. Put the two pickles on the bun, then the filet, and then the top part of the bun."

answer: A man feels utterly trapped in his dead-end job, toiling away with no sense of purpose. He looks back at how he got here and realizes he is replaceable and insignificant in the grand scheme of things. He feels physically drained by the environment and longing for something better. He fears this cycle will continue until he is just another imperceptible part of the background.

text: The narrator mentions becoming part of the background as one possibility, but it's not a central fear.

refinement: A man feels utterly trapped in his dead-end job, toiling away with no sense of purpose. He looks back at how he got here and realizes he is replaceable and insignificant in the grand scheme of things. He feels physically drained by the environment and longing for something better. He thinks this cycle might continue until he is just another imperceptible part of the background.

text: The answer can use another sentence. It can mention that thinking too much hurts.

refinement: A man feels utterly trapped in his dead-end job, toiling away with no sense of purpose. He looks back at how he got here and realizes he is replaceable and insignificant in the grand scheme of things. He feels physically drained by the environment and longing for something better. He thinks this cycle might continue until he is just another imperceptible part of the background. It gets to a point where thinking physically hurts, and he just goes through the motions.

text: Terrible job: "Then repeat until your soul has been crushed, pissed on, and every dream and fire that has ever existed in you has been stomped out by the ceaseless, monotonous work you subject yourself to in order to not even get by."

text: Replaceable: "You are simply a tiny little speck. In fact you aren’t even speck in the scheme of things. You are less than a pixel, you are less than even the red, blue, and green lights that make up a pixel. You are nonexistent and utterly replaceable and no one will notice if you go."

text: Fading into the background: "Sometimes the grind wears you down and grinds you to you are so thin that you become a part of the walls there. You are an everlasting stone that will be a part of where you are stuck, just like the walls."

answer: The narrator works in a restaurant making grilled cheese sandwiches for customers. He even hates himself for doing this on a daily basis. It can lead to burgers. He doesn't think if he is looked at as less of a human being. He longs a vegan diet.

text: The answer is made up and nonsensical. It should be scrapped.

text: There's no answer.

refinement: The narrator is stuck at his mundane and monotonous job. The lack of pay and time means that he can't pursue other career options. Even if he could, his only friends are his coworkers. The narrator feels stuck and can't figure out a reason to live. He tries not to think too much while going through the motions.

answer: The narrator describes the repetitive, lifeless routine he faces every day at his crummy soul-devouring job. Despite the crushing monotony, the only hope he can find is that someday he might escape the cycle. However, for most people, the ruthless routine eventually wears them down, leaving them destitute and without happiness or purpose.

text: The answer can use two more sentences. One could mention the obstacles the narrator faces.

refinement: The narrator describes the repetitive, lifeless routine he faces every day at his crummy soul-devouring job. Despite the crushing monotony, the only hope he can find is that someday he might escape the cycle. However, for most people, the ruthless routine eventually wears them down, leaving them destitute and without happiness or purpose. The narrator is held back by a lack of money, time, and energy.

text: Another sentence can mention that the final challenge the narrator faces is that all his friends are his coworkers.

refinement: The narrator describes the repetitive, lifeless routine he faces every day at his crummy soul-devouring job. Despite the crushing monotony, the only hope he can find is that someday he might escape the cycle. However, for most people, the ruthless routine eventually wears them down, leaving them destitute and without happiness or purpose. The narrator is held back by a lack of money, time, and energy. The fact that the only friends he has being his coworkers don't help any.

text: Terrible job: "Then repeat until your soul has been crushed, pissed on, and every dream and fire that has ever existed in you has been stomped out by the ceaseless, monotonous work you subject yourself to in order to not even get by."

text: Might escape: "There is a glimmer of a hope that one day you can escape the cycle of the daily grind. Get a degree if you are young enough, have a support system while you find a better job, or maybe you are stronger than most and do it all alone."

text: Wearing people down: "Not everyone is lucky though. Sometimes the grind wears you down and grinds you to you are so thin that you become a part of the walls there. You are an everlasting stone that will be a part of where you are stuck, just like the walls. Bills add up and sooner than you know it you are living out on the streets and left with nothing but free time. Maybe you cope with a steady dose of drugs. Maybe you cope with a healthier method. Either way it leads to the same thing."


split: train

text:
                                          Me

	Before we get into the depths of this story, I assume you are going to want to know about me. Who am I? Where did I come from? All that basic shit. And the truth is, who I am isn’t all the different from who the girl next door to you is. My situations have made me unique and the fact that I observe has made me different.

	At this point in time, I am 19 years old. I am slightly overweight, but you wouldn’t notice from looking at me. I have hips that one day will make giving birth easy but for now just make black guys go dammmmmnnnn girrllll. I have shoulder length hair that is some weird boxed shade of red that I dyed it out of anger. The cut was out of anger too. I’m 5’3.5 and yes that half an inch does matter. I wear a dress almost every day, not because I’m particularly girly anymore, but because it’s really all I have from my last relationship which was particularly controlling. I have two tattoos. One of an owl rests on my left ankle and the kittens from the aristocats parade around my right ribcage. Appearances make a person. This is why I am going so in depth so you can know me. My eyes, well they aren’t important. I want you too see my situations through your eyes. So take your eyes, put them on me, and there we go.

	As someone told me, my personality is weird. I took compliments when I was called quirky. Eccentric even was nice. Now I have just gone off the deep end, into plain weird. But, as you will learn, I was not always this way. I once had it together and knew how to control the weirdness. Now it just kinda spews out like some verbal garbage. It’s gross. But if people can laugh at me and their day is brightened, then awesome. I am someone what a perfectionist. Okay, complete lie there. I am a total perfectionist. I have a little motto in my head that say I must be “prim and proper and polite” at all times. I am working on this. As we all know, this is impossible. I did not know this until recently. The fact that I thought I could be perfect has led me to many a mental illness which we will get into latter. That is not important when trying to learn about the essence of me. And I think the essence of me which you need to know is that I am quirky, caring, and I can see into your soul weather you want me too our not.

	That last part is a little creepy, but that is besides the point. I will know when you want help or need help, regardless if you think you do. And that freaks most people out. I’ve had this super lame “gift” since I can remember. It’s more of a hassle than anything and leaves me stressed out. At any given moment I am flipping through my phone seeing if  I have someone’s number to see if they are ok. I can usually tell you exactly what’s wrong with them, and that’s kinda sucky too. People think this is total BS until I call them at 10pm at night and tell them that no, they should not go spend their last $20 on a little bit of weed. That they should take some advil and a bath and go to sleep and they will be just fine. Just wait till I do it to you. You will be scared. The knowing what’s up with everyone has gotten my head into a tizzy more often than once. I don’t stop to smell the roses or you know think about myself and eat sometimes, because I get so worked up about everyone else. Maybe that shows a great thing about my character. Maybe not.

	I think the most important thing that you know about me is, I did lose me for awhile. For a good chunk of 2 year I would say. I think I was brain washed. I really don’t know. But when you fall under the spell of a sociopath’s love, you do what they want. Not to say I never loved him, because I did, and still do, and probably always will, but he screwed me up. When you are 16 and 17 and 18 you should be finding who you are. Not being pushed into some mold. And if you get anything out of what I write it is that. Because here I am at 19, trying to make up for lost time and it sucks. But like everything else, we will get back to that lost time, we will get back to the sociopath I love(d). Because, while love is insignificant, it is important. Expecially when you can say it helped create the monster the in your head.

	There are other little things about me that aren’t important. Hobbies, jobs held, heck even friends. These will fall into place when they need to. Setting of my life is a small town in California. Just think of where you live, it’s much like that. A suburban town with nothing to do, no where to go. Tons of time to get trapped in your head. I want you to step into my shoes, but don’t lose who you are. We are one on this journey. And you are in for a ride.

title: The beginning of my short life story

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who is speaking?

answer: A 19 year-old girl.

answer: The speaker is a 19-year-old girl living in a suburban town in California.

answer: A 19 year old girl.

answer: The speaker is a nineteen-year-old woman living in a suburban community in California.

answer: A narrator

text: Nearly a tautology

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How does their gift work?

answer: Unknown.

text: The narrator says that she is able to see what is wrong with people. She believes this is a gift despite how stressful it can be. The gift allows the narrator to see into the souls of others.

refinement: The narrator says that she is able to see what is wrong with people. She believes this is a gift despite how stressful it can be. The gift allows the narrator to see into the souls of others.

answer: The narrator says that she is able to see what is wrong with people. She believes this is a gift despite how stressful it can be. The gift allows the narrator to see into the souls of others.

answer: Sociopaths, whenever they love someone, slowly brainwash that person into everything they do.

text: The narrator says that she is able to see what is wrong with people. She believes this is a gift despite how stressful it can be. The gift allows the narrator to see into the souls of others.

refinement: The narrator says that she is able to see what is wrong with people. She believes this is a gift despite how stressful it can be. The gift allows the narrator to see into the souls of others.

answer: The author can tell what is wrong with other people and feels obligated to reach out to them at times. This can cause stress for the author but they still feel this is important. The author's gift is to sense what is wrong with people.

answer: They can sense a person's current state universally.

text: The narrator says that she is able to see what is wrong with people. She believes this is a gift despite how stressful it can be. The gift allows the narrator to see into the souls of others.

refinement: The narrator says that she is able to see what is wrong with people. She believes this is a gift despite how stressful it can be. The gift allows the narrator to see into the souls of others.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What gender identity does this person have?

answer: This person identifies as a girl.

answer: Undefined.

text: It is defined.

answer: This person is most likely female.

answer: They have pronouns of "me."

text: Hilarious

answer: The person appears to be female.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Where does this person come from?

answer: The person states she is from the suburbs of California.

answer: A small town in California.

answer: The person comes from a suburban town in California.

answer: This person was born in California and currently resides there.

answer: The narrator is 19 years old, has red, shoulder-length hair, shoulder-length hair, and is taller than average.

text: Where is she from not her appearance

question: Write a ~5 sentence summary.

answer: At 19 years old, I am overweight, red haired, slightly troubled, and quick to understand others' problems. I lost myself during a period in my life, and during that time I was brainwashed by a sociopath. Now, I work to make up for lost time and am slowly discovering the true me. I believe that I can sense other's problems, and I may be a perfectionist at heart. Overall, I am quirky, caring, and seeing into people's souls.

text: 1st person

refinement: The narrator is a 19 year old girl with a peculiar gift of reading the souls of others. She is a perfectionist and very eccentric. She had a relationship when she was younger which was controlling, because she was dating a sociopath. She is now trying to make up for lost time. She lives in a small town in California.

answer: The narrator is 19 years old with shoulder length red hair. Her eyes are not important (at least to her). She has two tattoos, one an owl and kittens on her rib cage, the other on her ankle. She is quirky, caring, and can see into people's souls. She lost herself at the the hands of a sociopath for a good chunk of 2 years. She is looking to get back to be "normal".

answer: The narrator describes her looks, style, and personality. She states that she had confidence and control, but after her previous relationship, someone described her as "dating" a sociopath. She lost herself for a while, but recently seems to have found herself again. Though at this moment, she is going through their history, which is why they opened like this. She gives disclaimers about herself and about the strangeness of her gift. It's very good at telling if there's something wrong with someone.

answer: The narrator is a 19 year old girl with a peculiar gift of reading the souls of others. She is a perfectionist and very eccentric. She had a relationship when she was younger which was controlling, because she was dating a sociopath. She is now trying to make up for lost time. She lives in a small town in California.

answer: My name is _______, and I am 19 years old. I am slightly overweight, my hair is red and a bit crazy, and I am a perfectionist. Additionally, I gained some insight into the human psyche from my ex-boyfriend who was controlling and manipulative. I am quirky and caring, and I am currently working to overcome the sense of loss I experienced as a result of this relationship. Readers should expect a wild ride as they journey into my life.

text: 1st person

refinement: The narrator is a 19 year old girl with a peculiar gift of reading the souls of others. She is a perfectionist and very eccentric. She had a relationship when she was younger which was controlling, because she was dating a sociopath. She is now trying to make up for lost time. She lives in a small town in California.


text:
JOHN IRVIN CURTIN (June 17, 1837 – January 1, 1911) was a cousin of Pennsylvania governor Andrew Gregg Curtin. He led a regiment and then a brigade in the American Civil War.

Early life

Curtin was born at Eagle Forge, Pennsylvania. He was educated at Dickinson Seminary, later Lycoming College and became a civil engineer.

Civil War service

In 1861, Curtin served as a private in the 2nd Pennsylvania Infantry Regiment. On September 9, 1861, he was commissioned a captain in the 45th Pennsylvania Infantry. Curtin was promoted to major on July 30, 1862, and lieutenant colonel on September 4 of the same year. He became the regiment's colonel on April 13, 1863.[1]

In the Army of the Potomac, Curtin served in IX Corps. He led the regiment at the Battle of South Mountain and the Battle of Antietam in the place of Col. Thomas Welsh, who was holding brigade command.[2] Welsh return to command of the regiment for the Battle of Fredericksburg. When Welsh was promoted to the rank of brigadier general, Curtin became the regiment's commander. After IX Corps was transferred west, Curtin led the 45th Pennsylvania in the Siege of Vicksburg. He was absent, however, from the Knoxville Campaign.

When IX Corps returned to the Army of the Potomac in 1864, Curtin led his regiment at the Battle of the Wilderness in the 2nd Division of Brig. Gen. Robert B. Potter. Curtin took command of 1st Brigade, 2nd Division, on May 11, 1864, after Col. Zenas Bliss was injured at the Battle of Spotsylvania Court House. He led the brigade at the Battle of Cold Harbor and continued in command until June 18, when he was wounded in the Second Battle of Petersburg.

Curtin led his brigade again in the Siege of Petersburg from August 21 to January 13, 1865, before going on leave. (Col. Sumner Carruth led the brigade during Curtin's absence.) After this absence, Curtin resumed brigade command on February 11, serving until April 24. After the Confederate surrender, in the Department of Washington, Curtin led the 3rd Division, IX Corps, in place of Brig. Gen. John Hartranft from May 4 to July 8 and then his old brigade from July 8 to July 17, 1865.

On December 20, 1864, President Abraham Lincoln nominated Curtin for appointment to the grade of brevet brigadier general of volunteers, to rank from October 12, 1864, and the United States Senate confirmed the appointment on February 14, 1865.[3] He was mustered out of the volunteer service on July 17, 1865.[4]

Post war

Curtin died in Bellefonte, Pennsylvania on January 1, 1911.[5] He was buried at the Union Cemetery in Bellefonte.[6]

[1] Eicher, John H., and Eicher, David J., _Civil War High Commands_, Stanford University Press, 2001, . p. 194.

[2] Col. Thomas Welsh's Official Reports

[3] Eicher, 2001, p. 743.

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title: John I. Curtin

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

When was John I. Curtin bown?

answer: John I. Curtin was born on June 17, 1837.

answer: June 17 1837.

answer: John Curtin was born in 1837.

answer: Curtin was born on June 17, 1837.

answer: John was born in 1837.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who was John I. Curtin's cousin?

answer: Pennsylvania governor Andrew Gregg Curtain.

answer: Pennsylvania Gov. Andrew Gregg Curtin.

answer: John Curtin was Andrew Gregg Curtin's cousin.

answer: Andrew Gregg Curtin.

answer: John I. Curtin is the cousin of Pennsylvania Governor Andrew Gregg Curtin.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Where was John I. Curtin born?

answer: Eagle Forge, Pennsylvania.

answer: Curtin was born in Eagle Forge, Pennsylvania.

answer: John I. Curtin was born at Eagles Forge, Pennsylvania.

answer: Eagle Forge (now incorporated into Troy Township in Clearfield County, Pennsylvania)

answer: Curtin was born at Eagle Forge, Pennsylvania.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

To what appointment did Abraham Lincoln nominate John I. Curtin on December 20th 1864?

answer: Brevet brigadier general of volunteers.

answer: President Lincoln nominated Curtin for appointment to the grade of Brevet Brigadier General of volunteers.

answer: Brevet brigadier general of volunteers.

answer: President Lincoln nominated John I. Curtin for appointment to the grade of brevet brigadier general of volunteers.

answer: He was nominated for the grade of brevet brigadier general of volunteers.

question: Write a ~1 sentence summary.

answer: This article is about John I. Curtin, leader of a regiment and a brigade during the American civil war.

answer: John Curtin served in the Union Army during the Civil War, rising to lead a brigade. He was later awarded the grade of brevet brigadier general, and died in 1911.

text: One too many sentences.

refinement: John Curtin served in the Union Army during the Civil War, rising to lead a brigade and was later awarded the grade of brevet brigadier general, dying in 1911.

answer: This article discusses the life of John I. Curtin, a colonel in the 45th Pennsylvania Infantry Regiment of the Union army during the American Civil War.

answer: John I. Curtin was a colonel of a Pennsylvania regiment in early years of the Civil War.

answer: John Curtin was a Civil War officer who led a regiment and then a brigade. He received a nomination to the grade of brevet brigadier general of volunteers and retired from the military in 1865. He died in 1911.

text: One sentence too many.

refinement: John Curtin was a Civil War officer who received a nomination to the grade of brevet brigadier general of volunteers and retired from the military in 1865, going on to die in 1911.


text:
  It was like getting hit by a train. I knew I hadn’t literally been hit by a train, but in all my twelve years of existence i had never felt something that painful. He had said it wouldn’t hurt, but he lied.

   "That one was a little high", he said.

   "Yes sir", was all i could manage to reply.

   That rifle had a hell of a kick. I rubbed my shoulder to try and comfort my bones as they screamed in protest. My step father had promised to take me hunting but now i was having second thoughts.

   His name is John David Adams Senior. He has been married to my mom for the last two years. It wasn’t strange to me, having a new dad, like it was to most people. That’s mostly because i never had an old dad. For as long as I can remember it’s just been me and my mom. He is a nice man, although he can be very strict at times.

  We got up from the old wooden bench set up on the outskirts of a field about two hundred yards from our camp, and walked towards the bullseye I had been aiming for.

  The crisp mid-December air felt amazing, like a cold blanket kissing my face. As we walked, the smell of gunpowder that had saturated the air slowly dwindled away, and was replaced by the sweet aroma of freshly cut grass.

  As we reached the target, I felt a wave of disappointment wash over me. He had been right. The hole was nowhere near where I had been aiming for, but it was only my first shot, and we had a whole case of bullets to go through. As we walked back to the bench I rubbed my arm again, apologizing for the pain that was to come.

  Fifteen shots and a short ride later we arrived back at the camp to plan out my first hunt. Our camp was an old house in Natchez, Mississippi that had been converted into a hunting camp by a group of men Mr. John had befriended. From the outside, it looked like hell. The walls had boards missing and the roof patched in spots with sheets of tin, but from the inside it wasn’t half bad.

  As we walk through the front door into the living room I pass the huge map of the property that is used to show everyone where we would be the following day. “You see that spot there, number 24?” He asked.

  I replied “Yes sir.”

  “That’s where we will be tomorrow.”

  I woke the next morning to the sound of the alarm screeching like a fire engine alerting us to a new day. My bed was a sanctuary, a place to relax, but it was time to embrace the day and face the trials that were to come.

  As i pulled on my gear i glance at the clock and realize it is only four in the morning. That explains the iron gates that had replaced my eyelids constantly trying to slam shut.

  The ride to the stand was dark and quiet. Not in a frightening way though. it put me in a calm and comfortable mood. I could almost feel the forest surrounding me waiting for the sun to rise and give light to the new day, and the new events that would unfold.

  We parked on the road and walked to the stand, being as quiet as possible so as to not alert whatever was lurking in the dark trees. We are now predators, and somewhere, hidden behind a curtain of foliage, is my prey awaiting its fate.

  There are two chairs in the stand, each facing out a window that gave a full view of the two fields below. The fields were perpendicular to each other and connected in the corners, that is where our stand is set up. I positioned one chair so i could have a full view of each side at all times.

  As the sun slowly rose to its seat in the sky, the field came into view and revealed the life brimming below. I see chipmunks and birds going about their morning activities, but i see no deer.

  An hour or two goes by with no luck. My nose is starting to freeze when Mr. John taps me on the shoulder and points towards the field I was looking at. I didn’t see anything though, but readied my rifle anyway, just as he has taught me.

  Slowly, a deer creeps its way onto the field and I feel my heart begin to race. I let the animal come closer before preparing for the kill. Steadily I lower my head to the stock and gaze through the scope.

  My heart is leaping out of my chest, but i breathe deeply to attempt to calm it down.

  “Breathe out and squeeze,” he whispers.

  As the air escapes my lungs I slowly squeeze the trigger and ready myself for the impact. The world seems to slow down and disappear, leaving only me and my prey.

  Inside the scope that became my entire universe in that half a second, I hear the click of the hammer against the bullet then almost instantaneously the world explodes back to life. I see the birds flying in every direction, frightened by the sound of the shot, and in the very center of the field, lying still and lifeless, i see my target.

  We left the stand to see how I did. As we come upon the animal i feel pride for what I had accomplished and sorrow for the animal, but this is the way of life. Some must die so that others may survive. Natural selection has never seemed so real to me.

  “Beautiful shot, you did great. I’m proud of you, son,” He said, smiling at me.

  In that moment i am happier that i have ever been, not because i had ended a life, but because I had made him proud. In his eyes I can see the absolute truth in that statement, that for once in my life someone was proud of me.

  I looked into those eyes and saw the pride radiating from them, and I realized i had finally found what i had been hunting for all along.

 I love you, Dad.

  This is an original story written by me. It is also my first post, so i apologize for any formatting errors. I hope you liked it!

title: The Hunt

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the narrator's thoughts as they shot their target.

answer: The narrator feels pride for their accomplishment at shooting at their target. But, the narrator also feels sorrow for the animal and justifies it by saying this is the way of life. The narrator states that some must die so others can survive.

text: The final two sentences should be removed. They do not have anything to do with what the narrator actually feels or says, which is joy at having achieved their step-father's approval.

refinement: The narrator feels pride for their accomplishment at shooting at their target. But, the narrator says it is not because they had killed the animal. The narrator feels proud because they succeeded in winning their father's approval.

answer: The narrator thinks that life is about survival and some must die for others to survive such as the circle of life. When the narrator shoots their target, the birds flew in all directions. The narrator takes pride in their shot and they also feel sorrow.

text: The narrator does not think of these things. They think only of their father's approval. Therefore all three lines should be revised.

refinement: The narrator feels pride for their accomplishment at shooting at their target. But, the narrator says it is not because they had killed the animal. The narrator feels proud because they succeeded in winning their father's approval.

answer: The narrator thinks they have found what they have been searching for, the pride of their stepfather.

text: One should also add they do reflect a bit on death.

refinement: The narrator feels happy, but not because they have taken a life. The narrator feels they have found what they have been searching for, the pride of their stepfather.

answer: The narrator was excited and nervous as they aimed for and ultimately killed their target. They felt proud as their stepfather praised their shot. The goal of the hunt was to take down prey for survival, but ultimately this was a test of the self and the hunt proved that the narrator was capable.

text: This does not describe what the narrator actually feels.

refinement: The narrator was excited and nervous as they aimed for and ultimately killed their target. They felt proud as their stepfather praised their shot. They felt that pride was what they were actually hunting for.

answer: The narrator feels pride and satisfaction in shooting their target. They recognize the responsibility of ending a life, but ultimately feel happy accomplishing something they had been aimed at, making their stepfather proud.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the most important realization in this story.

answer: The most important realization that happens in this story is when the narrator finds out what they have been hunting for all along. The narrator was looking for pride and approval from their dad. When the narrator's dad said he was proud of him, it made the narrator the happiest he has been and he found what he was hunting for all along.

text: The final line repeats things already said in the summary

refinement: The most important realization that happens in this story is when the narrator finds out what they have been hunting for all along. The narrator was looking for pride and approval from their dad. When the narrator's dad said he was proud of him, it made the narrator the happiest he has been.

text: The verb "been" needs an adverb

refinement: The most important realization that happens in this story is when the narrator finds out what they have been hunting for all along. The narrator was looking for pride and approval from their dad. When the narrator's dad said he was proud of him, it made the narrator the happiest he has ever been.

answer: The most important realization in the story is that the protagonist realizes he has found what he has been hunting for all along: someone who is proud of him.

text: It should be that he is looking for a father. He did not have one before.

refinement: The most important realization in the story is that the protagonist realizes he has found what he has been hunting for all along: a father-figure who is proud of him.

answer: The narrator realizes that he is finally proud of himself after completing Mr. John's expectations of him. After relentlessly training the narrator to hit targets, the narrator realizes that he not only accomplished the goal, but that he is earning Mr. John's pride. After showing Mr. John pride, Mr. John shows the narrator his own pride. This brings a new feeling of comfort to the narrator, and fills him with a sense of hopefulness.

text: This is incoherent word-salad only loosely connected to the passage concerned. The idea of "showing him his pride" sounds odd. All of this should be removed.

refinement: The narrator realizes that he is finally proud of himself after completing Mr. John's expectations of him. After relentlessly training the narrator to hit targets, the narrator realizes that he not only accomplished the goal, but that he is earning Mr. John's pride.

text: In truth he realizes that he was seeking Mr. John's prize

refinement: The narrator realizes that he is finally proud of himself after completing Mr. John's expectations of him. After relentlessly training the narrator to hit targets, the narrator realizes that he not only accomplished the goal, but that he is earning Mr. John's pride. This makes him incredibly happy, and he realizes that is what he has been hunting for all along — not the deer.

answer: The most important realization in this story is that the boy realized that John David Adams was his new Dad. Also, he realized that he had found what he was hunting for: his father's pride for him.

text: In a way you could say he realized that but it is more subtle than that.

refinement: The most important realization in this story is that the boy realized that he had found what he was hunting for: his step-father's pride for him.

answer: The most important realization in the story is that the protagonist has found something they had been searching for all along: pride from their father. The protagonist finally feels like they have something to live up to, and they're happy and proud of themselves.


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Driving down the dirt road he could feel it. The anticipation had been building up steadily since the day he got his job. It was like anticipation had created hundreds of cocoons that all decided to spread there wings at the same time. That kind of thing happens when you get to see the girl of your dreams for the first time in four months.
Pulling into the drive way he decides to make sure he looked the part of "super excited boyfriend" and "super fine" at the same time. Maybe not so much the latter. He decides this is about as good as he's gonna get his hair, there's nothing in his teeth, he was finally going to get to see her. Stepping out of his car, he makes his way towards the front door and knocks. She throws the door open and they just hold each other for what seemed like forever, but in reality it was only 5 seconds. He pushes himself away and says, "I have to get this out of my system." He cups her chin in his right hand, tilting her head slightly upwards so that their lips met at the perfect angle. Love never seemed like such a tangible thing until that moment.

title: Reunited: Love

question: Why is he excited?

answer: He is excited to see the girl of his dreams.

text: Doesn't mention how long he hasn't seen her.

refinement: He is excited to see the girl of his dreams for the first time in four months.

answer: He is excited to see the girl of his dreams because it has been four months since they last saw each other. Love makes everything seem more tangible, and he feels that way when they kiss.

answer: He is excited to see his girlfriend for the first time in 4 months.

answer: He is excited to see the girl of his dreams.

text: Doesn't mention how long he hasn't seen her.

refinement: He is excited to see the girl of his dreams after four months without her.

question: Where is he going in his car?

answer: He is going to visit his girlfriend who he hasn't seen in 4 months.

answer: He is going to see his girlfriend.

text: Who he hasn't seen in 4 months.

refinement: He is going to see his girlfriend who he hasn't seen in 4 months.

answer: He is going to see his girlfriend.

text: Who he hasn't seen in 4 months.

refinement: He is going to see his girlfriend who he hasn't seen in 4 months.

answer: He is going to see his girlfriend.

text: Who he hasn't seen in 4 months.

refinement: He is going to see his girlfriend who he hasn't seen in 4 months.

question: Who are the main characters in the story?

answer: The man and his girlfriend are the only characters in the story.

answer: The narrator and his girlfriend.

answer: The main characters in the story are the girl of the boy's dreams and the boy.

answer: The main characters in this story are the unnamed boyfriend and girlfriend.

question: Where did his girlfriend go?

answer: She went to a different city for work.

text: Doesn't say.

answer: The girlfriend went away to college four months ago.

text: Doesn't say.

answer: This information is not given in the text.

answer: She went to college.

text: Doesn't say.

question: Why is she back?

answer: She's back from a trip.

text: Doesn't say.

answer: This information is not given in the text.

answer: The girl in the passage is back because she and the narrator are in love. They have been apart for a few months, but now they are reunited and can finally express their love for each other.

text: Doesn't say.

text: Doesn't say.

question: What are the major events of the story?

answer: The narrator drives to his girlfriend's house and they kiss.

answer: The protagonist is driving down a dirt road and feels anticipation building up. He pulls into the drive way and knocks on the door. The protagonist and the girl of his dreams hold each other for a few seconds before he pushes himself away and cups her chin in his right hand. He tilts her head slightly upwards so that their lips meet at the perfect angle.

answer: He is on his way to his girlfriend's house. He hasn't been this excited since he started his new job. He hasn't seen her in 4 months. They hug for the longest time and then kiss.

answer: -The main events of the story are the protagonist's arrival at the girl of his dreams' house and their reunion kiss.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: The passage is about a man who is reunited with his girlfriend after four months. They kiss and he says he has to get this out of his system.

answer: The narrator is excited to see his girlfriend after four months. He pulls into her driveway and makes sure he looks good. He knocks on the door and they embrace. He kisses her and feels love for the first time.

answer: The protagonist is reunited with his long-distance girlfriend after four months apart, and they share an emotional kiss. They both feel like love has never been more tangible than in that moment.

answer: A man is on his way to his girlfriend's house. He hasn't been this excited since he started his new job. He hasn't seen her in 4 months, so he makes sure that his appearance makes him look like the super excited boyfriend and super fine. They hug for the longest time and then kiss.


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LAKIA BARBER (born September 5, 1987 in Washington, DC) is an American former basketball player. She played college basketball for Monmouth University.[1]

Basketball

High school career

Barber attended Gwynn Park High School in Brandywine, Maryland. She was four-year letterwinner in basketball at Gwynn Park High School. She helped lead her squad to a combined 91-10 record during her four seasons and won Maryland State Championships in 2003 and 2004. She also won county tournament titles in 2004 and 2005. She earned four consecutive league championship trophies and two regional titles. She posted 15.0 points and 10.0 rebounds per game as a senior, up from her 11.0/8.0 stats as a junior. She was named first-team All-Gazette and first-team all-league (3A). She was honored as Washington Post honorable mention All-Met[2] and tabbed a McDonald's All-American nominee. She competed in the 3A/2A versus 4A All-Star Game as a senior and played in the Public vs. Private All-Star Game as well. She was also named Gwynn Park Most Valuable Player.

Collegiate career

Freshman season

Barber appeared of 27 of the team’s 28 games and shot 45-of-108 (41.7%) from the floor. She hit 20-of-30 (66.7%) free throws and pulled down 23 offensive and 22 defensive rebounds (1.7 rpg). She scored 110 points for a 4.1 points per game average. She scored career-high 14 points on 6-of-8 shooting against Navy (11/19). She tallied nine points and two steals against #9 Maryland (12/7) and scored seven points at St. Francis (N.Y.) (12/10). She contributed 11 points and five rebounds in 10 minutes at St. Francis (Pa.) (1/28), and scored 12 points in nine minutes against Wagner (2/4). She followed that up with eight points in 12 minutes at Central Connecticut State (2/6).

Sophomore season

Barber appeared in 29 games for the Hawks, making eight starts. She shot 72-of-194 (37.1%) from the field and 64-of-92 (69.6%) from the foul line. She scored 209 points on the season, averaging 7.2 points per game. She pulled down 127 rebounds while averaging 4.4 a game. She registered 14 steals, 9 blocked shots, and 16 assists for the squad. She collected 14 points while shooting seven-for-nine from the field in a win over Rider (11/17). She scored a season-high 19 points while grabbing eight rebounds and shooting 12-for-14 from the foul line against Marshall (11/23). She logged two steals, eight rebounds, and made six-out-of-seven foul shots against St. Francis [N.Y.] (12/10). She pulled down eight rebounds against Sacred Heart (1/13) and had three assists against Robert Morris (1/27). She tallied 17 points while shooting seven-for-eight from the field against Central Connecticut State (2/19). She collected a season-high ten rebounds while shooting a perfect six-for-six from the foul line in win over Fairleigh Dickinson (2/21). In March 2007, she tore her ACL in practice.[3]

Junior season

Appeared in 30 games, averaging 7.5 points and 3.5 rebounds per game.

Professional career

She signed with Black Star Mersch prior to the 2009-2010 season. In 10 games she averaged 21.0 points and 10.5 rebounds per game.[4]

Gridiron football

Barber played gridiron football for the D.C. Divas in the Women's Football Alliance from 2011 to 2013.[5]

Personal life

She is the daughter of Mark and Patrice Barber, and the sister of Brittney Barber.

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title: Lakia Aisha Barber

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about Lakia Aisha Barber's high school career?

answer: Lakia Aisha Barber attended Gwynn Park High School in Brandywine, Maryland. She was a four-year letterwinner and helped lead her squad to a state championship in 2004. She scored 110 points during the season, averaging 4.1 points per game. Barber we named the Most Valuable Player at Gwynn Park her final year of high school. She was honored as Washington Post honorable mention All-Met and tabbed a McDonald's All-American nominee. She received a full scholarship to Monmouth University and averaged 6.6 points per game for the Hawks.

text: There are some grammar issues with this response. There are two sentences that need to be edited for the grammar issues.

refinement: Lakia Aisha Barber attended Gwynn Park High School in Brandywine, Maryland. She was a four-year letterwinner and helped lead her squad to a state championship in 2004. She scored 110 points during the season, averaging 4.1 points per game. Barber was named the Most Valuable Player at Gwynn Park, her final year of high school. She was honored as a Washington Post honorable mention All-Met and tabbed a McDonald's All-American nominee. She received a full scholarship to Monmouth University and averaged 6.6 points per game for the Hawks.

text: Including the addition of Lakia helping her team win in 2003 and 2004 is very important.

refinement: Lakia Aisha Barber attended Gwynn Park High School in Brandywine, Maryland. She was a four-year letterwinner and helped lead her squad to a state championship in 2003 and 2004. She scored 110 points during the season, averaging 4.1 points per game. Barber was named the Most Valuable Player at Gwynn Park, her final year of high school. She was honored as a Washington Post honorable mention All-Met and tabbed a McDonald's All-American nominee. She received a full scholarship to Monmouth University and averaged 6.6 points per game for the Hawks.

answer: Barber was a four-year letter winner in basketball at Gwynn Park High School. She helped lead her team to 91-10 records and two Maryland State Championships during her four-year career. She had 15.0 points and 10.0 rebounds per game in her senior season and was named first-team All-Gazette and first-team all-league. Barber also competed in the 3A/2A All-Star Game as a senior and played in the Public vs. Private All-Star Game. Overall, Barber was a successful high school basketball player.

text: The term "letterwinner" is one word in the original passage and should reflect that in the response as well.

refinement: Barber was a four-year letterwinner in basketball at Gwynn Park High School. She helped lead her team to 91-10 records and two Maryland State Championships during her four-year career. She had 15.0 points and 10.0 rebounds per game in her senior season and was named first-team All-Gazette and first-team all-league. Barber also competed in the 3A/2A All-Star Game as a senior and played in the Public vs. Private All-Star Game. Overall, Barber was a successful high school basketball player.

answer: Barber played basketball for Gwynn Park High School, where she was four-time letterwinner, and led her squad to two Maryland State Championships. She excelled at both offense and defense, scoring 110 points and pulling down 23 offensive and 22 defensive rebounds during her freshman year. During her sophomore year, Barber saw a decrease in her scoring output but improved her rebounding. She tore her ACL during her junior year. In 2009-2010 she played football for the D.C. Divas in the Women's Football Alliance.

text: This response does not focus on Barber's high school career, but includes information from her college career in basketball and football. Most of this response needs to be deleted and re-written.

refinement: Barber played basketball for Gwynn Park High School, where she was four-time letterwinner, and led her squad to two Maryland State Championships.

text: It is important to add more about Barber's high school basketball career.

refinement: Barber played basketball for Gwynn Park High School, where she was four-time letterwinner, and led her squad to two Maryland State Championships. She helped lead her squad to a combined 91-10 record during her four seasons.  She had 15.0 points and 10.0 rebounds per game in her senior season and was named first-team All-Gazette and first-team all-league. Barber also competed in the 3A/2A All-Star Game as a senior and played in the Public vs. Private All-Star Game. Overall, Barber was a successful high school basketball player.

answer:
Lakia Aisha Barber was a four-year letter winner in basketball at Gwynn Park High School where she helped lead her squad to a combined 91-10 record during that time and won Maryland State Championships in 2003 and 2004. She also won county tournament titles in 2004 and 2005. She was named first-team All-Gazette and first-team all-league and was honored as Washington Post honorable mention All-Met and tabbed a McDonald's All-American nominee
She was also named Gwynn Park Most Valuable Player.

text: This response needs to add a period at the end of the second to last sentence and to delete a space before the last sentence.

refinement: Lakia Aisha Barber was a four-year letter winner in basketball at Gwynn Park High School where she helped lead her squad to a combined 91-10 record during that time and won Maryland State Championships in 2003 and 2004. She also won county tournament titles in 2004 and 2005. She was named first-team All-Gazette and first-team all-league and was honored as Washington Post honorable mention All-Met and tabbed a McDonald's All-American nominee. She was also named Gwynn Park Most Valuable Player.

answer: Barber attended Gwynn Park High School in Brandywine, Maryland. She was a four-year letterwinner in basketball and a 4A/3A All-Star and participated in an all-star game. She helped lead her squad to a 91-10 record during her four seasons and was named Gwynn Park High School's Most Valuable Player.

text: This response does not include crucial highlights of Barber's high school career playing basketball, and these details need to be added to the response.

refinement: Barber attended Gwynn Park High School in Brandywine, Maryland. She was a four-year letterwinner in basketball. She helped lead her squad to a 91-10 record during her four seasons. She posted 15.0 points and 10.0 rebounds per game as a senior. She was honored as a Washington Post honorable mention All-Met and tabbed a McDonald's All-American nominee. Additionally, she was named Gwynn Park High School's Most Valuable Player.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about Lakia Aisha Barber's sophomore season?

answer: Lakia Aisha Barber appeared in 29 games for the Hawks. She scored 209 points on the season, averaging 7.2 points per game. She collected a season-high ten rebounds while shooting a perfect six-for-six from the foul line in a win over Fairleigh Dickinson. In 2007, she tore her ACL in practice.

answer: Barber appeared in 29 games for the Hawks, making 8 starts. She shot 72-of-194 (37.1%) from the field and 64-of-92 (69.6%) from the foul line. She scored 209 points on the season, average 7.2 points per game. She pulled down 127 rebounds while averaging 4.4 a game. She registered 14 steals, 9 blocked shots, and 16 assists for the squad. She collected 14 points while shooting 7-for-9 from the field in a win over Rider (11/17). She scored a season-high 19 points while grabbing eight rebounds and shooting 12-for-14 from the foul line in a win by Marshall (11/23). She logged two steals, eight rebounds, and made six-out-of-seven foul shots against St. Francis [N.Y.] (12/10). She pulled down eight rebounds against Sacred Heart (1/13) and had three assists against Robert Morris (1/27). She tallied 17 points while shooting seven-for-eight from the field against Central Connecticut State (2/19). She collected a season-high ten rebounds while shooting a perfect 6-for-6 from the foul line in a win over Fairleigh Dickinson (2/21). In March 2007, she tore her ACL in practice.[

text: This response is a copy and paste response of what is provided in the original passage. The response should have highlighted important parts, not the whole paragraph.

refinement: Lakia Aisha Barber appeared in 29 games for the Hawks. She scored 209 points on the season, averaging 7.2 points per game. She collected a season-high ten rebounds while shooting a perfect six-for-six from the foul line in a win over Fairleigh Dickinson. In 2007, she tore her ACL in practice.

answer: Barber appeared in 29 games for the Hawks, making eight starts. She shot 72-of-194 (37.1%) from the field and 64-of-92 (69.6%) from the foul line. She scored 209 points on the season, averaging 7.2 points per game. She pulled down 127 rebounds while averaging 4.4 a game. She registered 14 steals, 9 blocked shots, and 16 assists for the squad.

text: Additional information included in the original passage can be included in the response to make it stronger.

refinement: Barber appeared in 29 games for the Hawks, making eight starts. She shot 72-of-194 (37.1%) from the field and 64-of-92 (69.6%) from the foul line. She scored 209 points on the season, averaging 7.2 points per game. She pulled down 127 rebounds while averaging 4.4 a game. She registered 14 steals, 9 blocked shots, and 16 assists for the squad. Additionally, she collected a season high ten rebounds while shooting a perfect six for six from the foul line in win over Farleigh Dickinson. She also tore her ACL in practice in March of 2007.

answer: Lakia Barber played 29 games for the Hawks in her sophomore season,  making eight starts. She averaged 7.2 points per game and scored 209 points. She averaged 4.4 rebounds per game. She totaled 14 steals, 9 blocked shots, and 16 assists for her team. She collected 14 points in a game against Rider for 19 points. She had a season-high of 16 against Sacred Heart, making 5 free throws in 6 attempts. She shot 12-of-14 from the foul line against Missiuri. She also persisted sports her level I ACL injury in her junior year.

text: In this response, the sentence highlighted does not make sense because it does not say anywhere in the article that Barber collected an X amount of points against Rider for 19 points. This sentence needs to be edited.

refinement: Lakia Barber played 29 games for the Hawks in her sophomore season,  making eight starts. She averaged 7.2 points per game and scored 209 points. She averaged 4.4 rebounds per game. She totaled 14 steals, 9 blocked shots, and 16 assists for her team. She collected 14 points in a game against Rider. She had a season-high of 16 against Sacred Heart, making 5 free throws in 6 attempts. She shot 12-of-14 from the foul line against Missiuri. She also persisted sports her level I ACL injury in her junior year.

answer: Barber appeared in 29 games for the Hawks and averaged 7.2 points per game, while shooting 37.1% from the field and 69.6% from the foul line. She scored a season-high 19 points while pulling down eight rebounds.

text: More details can be included in this response from the original passage.

refinement: Barber appeared in 29 games for the Hawks and averaged 7.2 points per game, while shooting 37.1% from the field and 69.6% from the foul line. She registered 14 steals, 9 blocked shots, and 16 assists for the squad. She scored a season-high 19 points while pulling down eight rebounds. She also collected a season high ten rebounds while shooting a perfect six for six from the foul line against Farleigh Dickinson. Barber ended the season with tearing her ACL in practice in March 2007.