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January 18, 1952

It was the dead of winter on the hollowed grounds of the Turner family’s vacation estate in northern Colorado. All was calm and quiet across the endless array of rolling hills, which so plainly swept through the ancient valley.
Mr. and Mrs. Turner were in a hurry, as they rushed to slide their coats on. Maurine Daniels, a seventeen-year-old New Yorker, new to Colorado helped them out the door.
“Alrite Maurine, emergency contacts on the fridge, there’s some games and food in the kitchen, no sweets for either of them, and off to bed at nine thirty, no exceptions.” “You two just have fun, we’ll be fine here.” Mrs. Turner chimed in; honestly Roger, trust the girl”, she said with a chuckle. “Maurine dear, if there’s anything at all you need don’t hesitate to give us a ring. Mr. Turners been a bit grouchy. Tonight the American Psychiatric Association is recognizing him for his contributions to the field.  “I swear, it’s year after year with these people.”  “Oh come on you old grouch. Bye kids!”
 The Turners dashed out the door. The skies opened up as heavy rain began to plummet down. Maurine shut the door as she heard the revving of an engine. The lights flashed on as the car zipped down the driveway.
	A few hours passed as Cindy and John played board game after board game with their baby sitter who forced a smile and pictured money. The clock struck nine thirty as Maurine lit up with anticipation. “Okay kids. Time for bed.” “Ten more minutes?” “John your father said no exceptions.” The children ran upstairs and hurried off to bed.
	Maurine dropped to the couch as if she had been shot. She rolled over, got up and turned on the television. “Thank God these kids don’t argue that much”, she thought to herself.  Suddenly the phone rang.
	Maurine walked over to pick it up. “Hello?” She could hear nothing more than a slight crinkling sound. “Hello?” After hanging up the phone she fell fast asleep. A few minutes later Cindy came downstairs.
	“What are you doing up?” asked Maurine playfully with a yawn. “I can’t sleep.” “Why, what’s wrong?” “The statue in my room is scary.” “Come on, we’ll take care of it. Let’s go see.” The two walked up the endless staircase to Cindy and John’s room.
	Maurine paced the vast room. She saw three statues. There was a knight, a clown, and a half-sized sculpture of a horse. She covered all three admittedly frightening figures. “All better. Now off to bed you”, said Maurine with a warm smile. Cindy smiled back and hopped into bed. “Good night.”
	Maurine went back downstairs and the phone rang as soon as she hit the couch. She rushed to the phone this time. “Hello?” “Maurine dear, its Mrs. Turner. I just wanted to check in. How are the kids?” “They’ve been perfect angels. I just put Cindy back to bed.” “Oh is she making a fuss?” “No she couldn’t sleep because of the clown statue in her room.” There was a long pause.
“Darling, there’s no clown statue.” “The one across from her bed?” Mrs. Turner went hysterical on the other end of the phone.
“Get the children out of the house! I’ll phone the police!” Mrs. Turner hung up.
	Maurine was confused. She walked up the stairs and slowly began to realize the horrific reality of her situation. At the same time, it hit her all at once. She panicked and exploded up the stairs, anxiously swung the door open, saw two of three statues, and the kids were gone. “Shit!”
There was an open window, which so calmly introduced the howling of winds that blew the white curtains of the children’s bedroom. They looked like ghosts dancing, taunting her.
 	She sprinted to the opening and gazed out into the endless flash of white that appeared to be the beginnings of a blizzard. Maurine hopped out the window onto the massive ledge, which canopied over the second floor porch on the massive three-story estate. She looked around, there was nothing in sight, and nowhere they could have gone.
 As she gazed into the far distance, she could make out what seemed to be a colossal barn. “Its too far away”, she thought to herself in a panicky disposition. She noticed a tiny window on the great wooden barn. It illuminated the pitch white of the furious storm.
Maurine’s eyes entranced, a chill ran down her spine, not from the five-degree monster that gave her frostbite, but from the nightmare that was her reality.
She rushed across the glowing white desert and bombarded the monstrous wooden door to find both Cindy and John asleep on the ground. Maurine rushed over and picked them up. She cried at the thought of her certainty that there was a clown lurking somewhere in the barn.
 She realized her intuition to be fact when the door slammed shut before she could set foot to freedom.
The clown “statue” glared at her and slowly paced her way, plank-by-plank, creak-by-creak.
She could feel herself stepping backward. “Who are you? Why are you doing this?” The clown, who stood in a narrow doorway, began to cackle wildly. He had a crackly thunderous voice. The kind of voice one gets from smoking three packs a day for over thirty years.
 “Why don’t you know my name?” “Oh my God, who are you?” she begged. “Oh I’m just -.”
Out of nowhere, the clown had a face of shock, he froze as his eyes widened and his expression went stoic. He fell to the ground. Maurine looked at the children and slowly made her way to the clown. There was a huge stab wound in his back. The monster laid face first in a pool of its own blood.
Maurine ran back to see who had saved her. “Oh thank . . . you.” Maurine stood there disappointed, her rescuer was nowhere in sight. She took the kids back to the house. Twenty minutes passed, and another hour before the Turners arrived. “Mommy, daddy!” yelled the children as they leapt into their parent’s arms. Mrs. Turner was in tears; “I’m just glad you’re all unharmed.” Mr. Turner walked up to a detective. “Who was this man and what did he want with my children?”
 The detective looked around and pulled Mr. Turner aside. He slowly leaned in and whispered; “He wasn’t after you or you’re kids. He knew Maurine would be here tonight. His name’s Douglas Daniels, no relation. He followed her from New York. He’s an old neighbor.”
“Who killed him?” “We aren’t sure.” Maurine was grateful to be alive. A detective came downstairs. “Ms. Daniels, you said there were three statues.” “There were.” “We only found a small horse statue.” “No there was that, the clown, and a . . . there was a knight.”
Another detective came down; “we found a sword with blood on the ridge.” Maurine felt that same chill she had when the window lit up, only this time a smile crossed her face.

title: Silent Ridge

question: What is Mr Turner's profession?

answer: Mr Turner's profession is "psychiatrist".

text: Tonight the American Psychiatric Association is recognizing him for his contributions to the field.

answer: Mr Turner's profession is psychiatry.

text:
Mr Turner's profession is (in the field of) psychiatry.
or
Mr Turner is a psychiatrist.

text: Tonight the American Psychiatric Association is recognizing him for his contributions to the field.

answer: Probably a mental health professional, as he's being honored by the American Psychiatric Association.

text: Tonight the American Psychiatric Association is recognizing him for his contributions to the field.

question: Why does the babysitter "force a smile and picture money"?

answer: The babysitter forces a smile to keep up appearances and stay motivated as she earns her monetary compensation.

text:
The clock struck nine thirty as Maurine lit up with anticipation. “Okay kids. Time for bed.” “Ten more minutes?” “John your father said no exceptions.” The children ran upstairs and hurried off to bed.
Maurine dropped to the couch as if she had been shot. She rolled over, got up and turned on the television. “Thank God these kids don’t argue that much”

answer: They are not having a great time, and are reminding themselves that they are just doing this for the cash at the end of the night.

text:
. The clock struck nine thirty as Maurine lit up with anticipation. “Okay kids. Time for bed.” “Ten more minutes?” “John your father said no exceptions.” The children ran upstairs and hurried off to bed.
Maurine dropped to the couch as if she had been shot. She rolled over, got up and turned on the television. “Thank God these kids don’t argue that much”

answer: Since she knows that the children's parents will be gone for the evening, she anticipates having to provide entertainment for them and is therefore eagerly anticipating the money she will receive for doing so.

text:
. The clock struck nine thirty as Maurine lit up with anticipation. “Okay kids. Time for bed.” “Ten more minutes?” “John your father said no exceptions.” The children ran upstairs and hurried off to bed.
Maurine dropped to the couch as if she had been shot. She rolled over, got up and turned on the television. “Thank God these kids don’t argue that much”

question: What is a "five-degree monster"?

answer: A "five-degree monster" is someone or something that is a monster, or a terrible person, especially because of a situation. For example, in this passage one might consider "the monsters" to be "the clown" and "Douglas Daniels."

text: the five degree monster refers to a cold storm: "It illuminated the pitch white of the furious storm."

refinement: The "five-degree monster" refers to the storm.

answer: A "five-degree monster" is a wind that could feel like five degrees when sleet falls.

text: to be specific, these are storm winds that are very cold.

text: "It illuminated the pitch white of the furious storm."

answer: The text does not clarify, but perhaps it has to do with the coldness of the temperature outside.

text: The text actually identifies the correct answwer: the five degree monster refers to a cold storm: "It illuminated the pitch white of the furious storm."

question: Who ultimately saved Maurine?

answer: It is implied that the knight statue did.

text:
“No there was that, the clown, and a . . . there was a knight.”
Another detective came down; “we found a sword with blood on the ridge.” Maurine felt that same chill she had when the window lit up, only this time a smile crossed her face

answer: Some say the hero is a woman, who, across the ages, has labored willingly upon thankless tasks—and without expectation of pay. How magnificent is the world made brighter from her endeavor.

text:
The answer has no relation to the question.

The answer should be: the knight.

answer: The killer who stabbed Douglas.

text: While the answer is technically correct, the text has a more specific identity for this character: the knight.

text:
“We only found a small horse statue.” “No there was that, the clown, and a . . . there was a knight.”
Another detective came down; “we found a sword with blood on the ridge.” Maurine felt that same chill she had when the window lit up, only this time a smile crossed her face.

question: Write a ~9 sentence summary.

answer: Maurine is babysitting two kids. She noticed three statue figurines in their bedroom: a knight, a clown, and a horse. Upon putting the kids to bed, their mother calls, and Maurine mentions the creepiness of the figurines. The kids' mother pauses and tells her to get out of the house-there's no clown figurine. While the mom calls the police from her date, Maurine finds the children are missing, as are the statues, and runs outside. The kids are knocked out on the ground and the now life-sized clown menaces her. However, something stabs and kills the clown. The police arrive and are unable to determine who did it, but they reveal it was a man named Douglas Daniels who had followed Maurine to town. The police had not located the knight statue, but they had found a sword with blood on it.

text: Cindy and John played board game after board game with their baby sitter

text: There was a knight, a clown, and a half-sized sculpture of a horse.

text:
 “No she couldn’t sleep because of the clown statue in her room.” There was a long pause.
“Darling, there’s no clown statue.” “The one across from her bed?” Mrs. Turner went hysterical on the other end of the phone.
“Get the children out of the house! I’ll phone the police!” Mrs. Turner hung up

text: She rushed across the glowing white desert and bombarded the monstrous wooden door to find both Cindy and John asleep on the ground.

text: The clown “statue” glared at her and slowly paced her way, plank-by-plank, creak-by-creak.

text: Maurine looked at the children and slowly made her way to the clown. There was a huge stab wound in his back. The monster laid face first in a pool of its own blood.

text:
“No there was that, the clown, and a . . . there was a knight.”
Another detective came down; “we found a sword with blood on the ridge.” Maurine felt that same chill she had when the window lit up, only this time a smile crossed her face.

answer:
Maurine Daniels, a young woman assisting the Turner family with babysitting their two children during their absence, is drawn into a nightmare when she answers the phone while the kids are asleep. She finds that white sheets have replaced her pets, the children are gone, and the door has been slammed shut by a figure wearing an all-white shroud and carrying a sword.

Suddenly, as Maurine Daniels is on the phone speaking with Mrs. Turner and trying to find Cindy and John, the phone call gets cut off with a static noise in the phone. The children abruptly return to the house, but Mrs. Turner doesn't seem satisfied with the children's safety. Just then, the front door slams shut, and there is a loud banging and screaming from upstairs. Maurine gathers the kids, and finds a man wearing a white blanket, who happens to be the murdered body of Douglas Daniels, a man Maurine had to testify against in court in New York. Maurine would have loved to take the man with her for hesitating to try to free her from a Litchfield asylum.

text: The only correct information in the summary is that Maurine is babysitting the two Turner children. All the other lines are incorrect.

refinement: Maurine Daniels is a young woman babysitting the Turner family's two children. She noticed three statue figurines in their bedroom: a knight, a clown, and a horse. Upon putting the kids to bed, their mother calls, and Maurine mentions the creepiness of the figurines. The kids' mother pauses and tells her to get out of the house-there's no clown figurine. While the mom calls the police from her date, Maurine finds the children are missing, as are the statues, and runs outside. The kids are knocked out on the ground and the now life-sized clown menaces her. However, something stabs and kills the clown. The police arrive and are unable to determine who did it, but they reveal it was a man named Douglas Daniels who had followed Maurine to town. The police had not located the knight statue, but they had found a sword with blood on it.

text: Cindy and John played board game after board game with their baby sitter

answer: The novel is about a seventeen-year-old girl who is hired to take care of John and Cindy one snowy day. The parents rush out to a meeting and leave a small statue that causes their daughter to have a fit. The two wander around the place and Maurine tries to look for them without success. The child returns to the house and see blood on a knight statue with the actual villain inside.

text: The entirety of the summary is wrong save for the fact that the girl is babysitting John and Cindy.

refinement: The novel is about Maurine, who is hired to take care of John and Cindy one snowy day. She noticed three statue figurines in their bedroom: a knight, a clown, and a horse. Upon putting the kids to bed, their mother calls, and Maurine mentions the creepiness of the figurines. The kids' mother pauses and tells her to get out of the house-there's no clown figurine. While the mom calls the police from her date, Maurine finds the children are missing, as are the statues, and runs outside. The kids are knocked out on the ground and the now life-sized clown menaces her. However, something stabs and kills the clown. The police arrive and are unable to determine who did it, but they reveal it was a man named Douglas Daniels who had followed Maurine to town. The police had not located the knight statue, but they had found a sword with blood on it.

text: Cindy and John played board game after board game with their baby sitter

answer: Maurine is taking care of Cindy and John Turner, two children of a famous psychiatrist who is recognized that night. Suddenly, she receives a phone call from their parents telling her to get the kids out of the house because there is a killer on the loose and the detective needs to do questioning. When she arrives there, the door is locked, and she can hear it being cackled from inside. When she looks inside, a clown statue is shown as a killer. He has a stab wound on his back from a person who he soon passes. When the parents arrive, they talk to a detective and it is mentioned that nobody knows who killed him but they found the sword used close to the body.

text:
A lot of the details are false or presented in the wrong context.
The only correct details are:
- Maurine is babysitting Cindy and John Turner whose father is a psychiatrist who is being recognized that night
- the clown dies from a stab wound on his back
- the parents arrive and the detective mentions nobody has identified the clown's killer but they found a sword

Solution: omit and replace the rest of the summary

refinement: Maurine is babysitting two kids. She noticed three statue figurines in their bedroom: a knight, a clown, and a horse. Upon putting the kids to bed, their mother calls, and Maurine mentions the creepiness of the figurines. The kids' mother pauses and tells her to get out of the house-there's no clown figurine. While the mom calls the police from her date, Maurine finds the children are missing, as are the statues, and runs outside. The kids are knocked out on the ground and the now life-sized clown menaces her. However, something stabs and kills the clown. The police arrive and are unable to determine who did it, but they reveal it was a man named Douglas Daniels who had followed Maurine to town. The police had not located the knight statue, but they had found a sword with blood on it.

text: Tonight the American Psychiatric Association is recognizing him for his contributions to the field

text: Cindy and John played board game after board game with their baby sitter

text: The clown “statue” glared at her and slowly paced her way, plank-by-plank, creak-by-creak.

text: Maurine looked at the children and slowly made her way to the clown. There was a huge stab wound in his back. The monster laid face first in a pool of its own blood.

answer: The story begins with a seventeen-year-old girl new to Colorado taking care of kids while their parents go out to their work's gala night. Suddenly, the phone rings and her employer's voice, sounding frantic, tells her to "get the children out of the house, quickly." There has been a murder, and an unknown assailant brought the kids upstairs. Maurine rushes upstairs, while downstairs Maggie slumbers. After a few minutes of looking for the kids, Maurine jumps out of a second story window and finds the kids fast asleep on the ground, but there is no key figure anywhere. While the child are happy to see their parents, the unknown assailant may still be lurking in the barn.

text:
The summary does not represent the proper chronological order of events leading to severe loss of context. It also misses a lot of key details.

- lacks the part where Maurice sees the "statues"
- wrong context of the phone call

refinement:
The story begins with a seventeen-year-old girl new to Colorado taking care of kids while their parents go out to their work's gala night.

Maurice finds three statues in the girl's bedroom, so she covers them up. When she tells the mother about it over the phone, the mother frantically alerts Maurice that there is no clown statue. Maurice rushes upstairs to find the children gone.

After a few minutes of looking for the kids, Maurine jumps out of a second story window and finds the kids fast asleep on the ground, but there is no key figure anywhere. While the child are happy to see their parents, the unknown assailant may still be lurking in the barn.

text:
The sequence after Maurice finds the kids missing is wrong.

-she spots the barn
-she goes to the barn
-she finds the kids
-the clown corners her

refinement:
The story begins with a seventeen-year-old girl new to Colorado taking care of kids while their parents go out to their work's gala night.

Maurice finds three statues in the girl's bedroom, so she covers them up. When she tells the mother about it over the phone, the mother frantically alerts Maurice that there is no clown statue. Maurice rushes upstairs to find the children gone.

Maurine looks out the window and sees light in the barn. She heads there and finds the kids fast asleep on the ground, but the clown blocks her way.

text: The resolution of events is not presented at all in the summary

refinement:
The story begins with a seventeen-year-old girl new to Colorado taking care of kids while their parents go out to their work's gala night.

Maurice finds three statues in the girl's bedroom, so she covers them up. When she tells the mother about it over the phone, the mother frantically alerts Maurice that there is no clown statue. Maurice rushes upstairs to find the children gone.

Maurine looks out the window and sees light in the barn. She heads there and finds the kids fast asleep on the ground, but the clown blocks her way.

The clown drops dead from a wound in the back. The parents and the detectives arrive. The detective says they do not know who stabbed the clown, but they found a sword with blood. Maurice recalls a knight statue, but is told that like the clown, there is no knight statue.

text: Cindy and John played board game after board game with their baby sitter

answer: Roger Turner and his wife are very busy people and they hire their seventeen-year-old babysitter, Maurine Daniels, to watch over their children John and Cindy, and their mansion. That night, they are going to a psychiatry event so they leave the kids with Maurine. Suddenly, the phone rings and Mrs. Turner says that there is a clown statue in Cindy's bedroom and Maurine needs to take the children out of the house. Mrs. Turner calls the police and tells Maurine to send the kids to safety. Maurine runs up to the attic and is shocked to see John and Cindy gone. She goes outside to see if the kids are out on the grounds, but she knows they aren't because she would have seen them running in her field of vision. She notices a barn and believes they are in it. The ground is pure white from a blizzard and there's a barn with a flickering light. She goes in to find two statues and no children. The grounds keeper is slumped in the corner with a stab wound in his back. The artist of the sculptures, Roger Daniels, bl

text: Aside from the identity if Maurice and the Turners, the rest of the summary is inaccurate.

refinement: Maurine is babysitting two kids. She noticed three statue figurines in their bedroom: a knight, a clown, and a horse. Upon putting the kids to bed, their mother calls, and Maurine mentions the creepiness of the figurines. The kids' mother pauses and tells her to get out of the house-there's no clown figurine. While the mom calls the police from her date, Maurine finds the children are missing, as are the statues, and runs outside. The kids are knocked out on the ground and the now life-sized clown menaces her. However, something stabs and kills the clown. The police arrive and are unable to determine who did it, but they reveal it was a man named Douglas Daniels who had followed Maurine to town. The police had not located the knight statue, but they had found a sword with blood on it.


split: train

text:
Matt D'Amico
Mr. Cusick
Creative Writing
25 Feburary 2013

The year is 2175, forty years after the Great War. The war that shaped the New World into what it is now, a emotionless, unimaginative nation where its inhabitants only goal is for “the betterment of the country and for our great ruler President Samuel Hudson”. The people are brainwashed into working, not for pay, but for the privilege of life. And when they go home they sit, mindlessly, in front of their television taking in the only channel that has been running for the past forty years, preaching to them and their kids about how perfect their life is. The government has stripped its people of all emotion, because with emotion comes ambition, and with ambition comes the want for a better life. It has filled the void of emotion with the “feeling” of national pride.

For the entire twenty-two years of his life George Huxley lived his life every other human being does, like a robot. He wakes up and puts on his gray jumpsuit, with the little name tag that read Mr. G. Huxley, that he got when he joined the workforce at the age of eighteen. Steps outside of his one bedroom apartment, and goes downstairs into the basement of his complex. This is where he works. All jobs are located in the same building as the apartment complexes as to prevent as much human interaction as possible. George’s job is manufacturing Infantile Joy Modules which are virtual reality helmets that are put on babies to silence their crying and allow the assigned caretakers to enjoy their television in peace. He is told by his supervisor how lucky he is to be working and living in this great country. This never sits well with George, but he doesn’t know why. After work he walks up the stairs to the lobby to get dinner. He eats at the same “restaurant” every day, President Samuel Hudson’s Food and Drink. He gets the same bland meal every day then proceeds back to his home. Back in his room, he pushes the power button of his television, but the T.V. doesn’t turn on. “Hmmm, that’s odd” he thinks to himself. He would go get a home supervisor to get it fixed but he is too tired and decides to sit down on the metal folding chair that he calls furniture. Sitting in the silence George is able to think to himself, something he hasn’t done for a very long time. He begins conjuring up images of his childhood days where he would be able to play with the other children. He finally goes to sleep with a feeling he has never felt before. A feeling that he and his fellow countrymen have been numb to for their entire existence. This feeling is happiness.

The next day at work when his supervisor says  how lucky he is to be working and living in this great country, he is very disturbed, but he doesn’t know why. After work he decides to skip dinner and goes straight home so he can be by himself in that wonderful silence. George begins longing for that silence every waking hour he is at work. He sees his co-workers blank stare and wants so badly to tell them what they are missing. That he has felt happiness, but he knows that they won’t understand because they haven’t felt anything for too long and more importantly he did not want to risk getting caught. He had heard stories of people that went crazy and started thinking for themselves. He heard about what the government did to those evil freethinkers, and knew that getting caught with these emotions wasn’t an option.

It has been a month since George’s television has broke, he is aware of the world around him and realizes what he must do. After work he stops at President Samuel Hudson’s Food and Drink. He sees that their is a new cashier. “Hello mam, I haven’t seen you working here before, are you new?” he asks. “Yes sir, this is my first day. I am so excited to be working for my terrific country.” She responds with a childlike excitement. “Very good” George replies. He reads her name tag Ms. Mary King. He gets the same tasteless meal then goes up to look for Ms. Mary Kings room. Because she is new he knows that her room will be somewhere on the bottom floor (the order of the floors go from the most experienced at the top to the neophytes at lower floors.) He finds the door that reads M. King and is able to walk straight into her room because crime is hardly an issue where one’s only occupation is work and television. Once in her room he is greeted by that sweet, freeing silence. He takes her T.V. and dismantles it rendering it useless, feeling something he has never felt before, accomplishment. After his task is complete he goes back down to the lobby There he sees Mary, with that same childlike wonder. He waits there until her shift is over then followers her to her room. Once he sees the door close he begins to walk down her hallway. He puts his ear on her door and hears her struggling to put her television on. “Hello, sir are you my floor’s supervisor?” she asks with a palpable frustration. “Yes, yes I am, what can I do for you?” he confidently responds. “My T.V. seems to be broken”. “Alright, let me take a look” and they both walk into the room. “I’m pressing the button but it won’t turn on” she says. “Mary... I am not the floor supervisor. My name is George Huxley.” George says not knowing how she will react. “Okay, George, but why did you say you were the supervisor?” she aks. “Listen Mary, I need to warn you about something, something unimaginable, something that humans haven’t been able to experience for a long, long time.” he preaches to her. Mary sees the genuine look of concern and something seen hasn’t seen in many people’s face. “I need to tell you of this before this country brainwashes you and your just another numb robot walking around with no drive or purpose.” he pleads. “Brainwash? Drive? Purpose?” she asks with a flurry of thoughts racing through her head. “Listen, I know this may all sound strange to you, I know you think that you live in a perfect world, but this world is far from perfect Mary. I need you to trust me. Do you trust me?” As he says this he reaches for her hand and when their hands touch she says, “I, I guess, what are we going to do though?” His eyes light up “I want you to sit and think, no television, and just think?” “Think? About what?” she asks, she has never heard of such a strange activity. “About anything, about how great your life was when you were a child, no cares, no worries, just you and your friends.” He gets up and walks towards the door, turns around and says “and remember, just because you are told to do something, and you see everyone else mindlessly following what they are told to do doesn’t mean they are right. The most important thing in this life is not the beloved country or the great ruler, it’s you.” He opens the door and walks out into the hallway. There are two colossal police officers, with blank stares waiting for him.

title: Just started writing, this is my first work. What do you think?

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How old is George?

answer: 22

answer: George is 22 years old.

answer: George is 22 years old.

answer: George is 22 years old.

answer: George is 22 years old.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What allows George to think for himself?

answer: George's television breaks. He takes a walk to the restaurant where he comes to the conclusion that he needs to think for himself, which is not the norm of the residents of the new world. The residents have been living in the modern collective, creating "equality" regardless of the individual perspective of their reality.

text: "He takes a walk to the restaurant where he comes to the conclusion that he needs to think for himself, which is not the norm of the residents of the new world. The residents have been living in the modern collective, creating "equality" regardless of the individual perspective of their reality." - unnecessary information that should be deleted.

answer: His television breaks and he loses access.

answer: George is able to think for himself due to the unexpected breakdown of his apartment complex's T.V. This leaves him in silence and allows him to think without the interruption of televised propaganda. He realizes that happiness is something that everyone should experience and sets out with the intent of opening other people's minds.

text: "This leaves him in silence and allows him to think without the interruption of televised propaganda. He realizes that happiness is something that everyone should experience and sets out with the intent of opening other people's minds." - unnecessary information that should be deleted.

refinement: George is able to think for himself due to the unexpected breakdown of his apartment complex's T.V.

answer: George is able to think for himself because his television broke. This removed the government-provided noise and allowed George to find the silence that allowed him to think. Discovering that he was capable of thought and feeling was what allowed him to break free of the state of diaponse. This realization allowed George to begin advocating for himself and others.

text: "This removed the government-provided noise and allowed George to find the silence that allowed him to think. Discovering that he was capable of thought and feeling was what allowed him to break free of the state of diaponse. This realization allowed George to begin advocating for himself and others." - unnecessary information that should be deleted.

refinement: George is able to think for himself because his television broke.

answer: George's TV breaks which allows him to think for himself.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does George do for a living?

answer: George's job is manufacturing Infantile Joy Modules.

answer: George works at a factory manufacturing Infantile Joy Modules, which are virtual reality helmets put on babies to quiet their crying. The job was provided through the work force and he feels unhappy with his occupation. He begins to rebel after his television breaks and begins instructing new employee Mary King to think for herself. Police descend on him when they find him in Mary's room.

text: "The job was provided through the work force and he feels unhappy with his occupation. He begins to rebel after his television breaks and begins instructing new employee Mary King to think for herself. Police descend on him when they find him in Mary's room." - unnecessary information that should be deleted.

refinement: George works at a factory manufacturing Infantile Joy Modules, which are virtual reality helmets put on babies to quiet their crying.

answer: George works in a factory making Infantile Joy Modules, and has been living a life devoid of emotion for his whole life until his T.V. breaks. He has experienced happiness for the first time and decides to open Ms. Mary King's eyes to the truth behind the facade that the government has built. He visits her at work and warns her, then is confronted by police, but manages to escape.

text: "and has been living a life devoid of emotion for his whole life until his T.V. breaks. He has experienced happiness for the first time and decides to open Ms. Mary King's eyes to the truth behind the facade that the government has built. He visits her at work and warns her, then is confronted by police, but manages to escape." - unnecessary information that should be deleted.

refinement: George works in a factory making Infantile Joy Modules.

answer: He works in the Infantile Joy Module Manufacturing Assembly, which is used to silence the crying of babies so their caretakers to enjoy their T.V.

text: "to enjoy" - replace with "can enjoy"

refinement: He works in the Infantile Joy Module Manufacturing Assembly, which is used to silence the crying of babies so their caretakers can enjoy their T.V.

answer: George manufactures Infantile Joy Modules and takes care of babies.

text: "and takes care of babies." - is incorrect. George doesn't take care of babies. The device he makes silence the cries of babies so their caretakers can watch TV.

refinement: George manufactures Infantile Joy Modules and takes care of babies.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Whose television does George break?

answer: The television belonging to Mary King.

answer: George breaks Mary King's television.

answer: Officials from the government arrive in an effort to set George's mind back to normal because he has disobeyed the rules of the country.

text: "Officials from the government arrive in an effort to set George's mind back to normal because he has disobeyed the rules of the country." - Does not answer the question. Rewrite the entire sentence.

answer: He breaks his neighbor's, whom he became friends with aged nine, TV.

text: "He breaks his neighbor's, whom he became friends with aged nine, TV." - Does not answer the question (and doesn't make any sense). Rewrite the entire sentence.

answer: George breaks the television belonging to Ms. Mary King.

question: Write a ~3 sentence summary.

answer: In the year 2175, President Samuel Hudson runs a totalitarian government that prevents people from having their own ambitions. Life is defined by showing people they must be thankful for what they are given. One day people begin to feel emotions in people, and life dramatically changes when a man named George takes off a woman's television.

text: "One day people begin to feel emotions in people, and life dramatically changes when a man named George takes off a woman's television." - is incorrect. Nobody else but George feels something. George also doesn't take off the TV - he dismantles it. Rewrite the sentence to reflect what happens to George when his TV breaks.

refinement:
In the year 2175, President Samuel Hudson runs a totalitarian government that prevents people from having their own ambitions.
Life is defined by showing people they must be thankful for what they are given.
When 22-year-old George's television suddenly breaks, he's able to think for himself and tries to influence another person, Mary King, by breaking her TV.

text: "Life is defined by showing people they must be thankful for what they are given." - must include that the government does this by brainwashing the people using the TV.

refinement:
In the year 2175, President Samuel Hudson runs a totalitarian government that prevents people from having their own ambitions.
Life is defined by showing people they must be thankful for what they are given, using televisions as tools for brainwashing the population.
When 22-year-old George's television suddenly breaks, he's able to think for himself and tries to influence another person, Mary King, by breaking her TV.

answer: George Huxley works as a "floor supervisor" at Food and Drink, an eatery that's strictly for the government and workers. His job is apparently to manufacture Infantile Joy Modules, or virtual reality helmets that silence babies' crying and allow for peace. One day, he purposely goes offline so he can be free of the numbing suggestions from the government, and he takes the television from Mary King to give her a chance to think independently for herself.

text: "George Huxley works as a "floor supervisor" at Food and Drink," - this is incorrect. George is not a "floor supervisor" and he doesn't work at Food and Drink - Mary King does. A complete rewrite is needed.

refinement:
George Huxley is a 22-year-old factory worker living in an emotionless, unimaginative nation in the year 2175, where people are brainwashed to believe that their only goal is to work, not for pay, but for the privilege of life.
His job is apparently to manufacture Infantile Joy Modules, or virtual reality helmets that silence babies' crying and allow for peace.
One day, he purposely goes offline so he can be free of the numbing suggestions from the government, and he takes the television from Mary King to give her a chance to think independently for herself.

text: "His job is apparently to manufacture Infantile Joy Modules, or virtual reality helmets that silence babies' crying and allow for peace." - remove "apparently" and replace "allow for peace" with "allow their caretakers to watch TV without interruption." Also, remove the comma in "modules,"

refinement:
George Huxley is a 22-year-old factory worker living in an emotionless, unimaginative nation in the year 2175, where people are brainwashed to believe that their only goal is to work, not for pay, but the privilege of life.
His job is to manufacture Infantile Joy Modules or virtual reality helmets that silence babies' crying and allow their caretakers to watch TV without interruption.
One day, he purposely goes offline so he can be free of the numbing suggestions from the government, and he takes the television from Mary King to give her a chance to think independently for herself.

text: "he purposely goes offline" - this is incorrect. He doesn't break his TV on purpose. It just conked out on him. He also doesn't take Mary King's TV - he breaks her TV. Rewrite the sentence.

refinement:
George Huxley is a 22-year-old factory worker living in an emotionless, unimaginative nation in the year 2175, where people are brainwashed to believe that their only goal is to work, not for pay, but the privilege of life.
His job is to manufacture Infantile Joy Modules or virtual reality helmets that silence babies' crying and allow their caretakers to watch TV without interruption.
One day, his TV unexpectedly breaks and he's free of the numbing suggestions from the government, which makes him break Mary King's TV to give her a chance to think independently for herself.

answer: George is living in a dystopian society when his TV breaks. Instead of fixing it, he begins to think for himself. He then breaks someone else's TV to try and get them to think for themselves, but is caught by two police officers.

text: "George is living in a dystopian society when his TV breaks." - must explain that the government uses television to brainwash people.

refinement:
George is living in a dystopian society that uses TV to brainwash the population when his TV breaks.
Instead of fixing it, he begins to think for himself.
He then breaks someone else's TV to try and get them to think for themselves, but is caught by two police officers.

text: "someone else's TV to try and get them to think for themselves" - must use Mary King

refinement:
George is living in a dystopian society that uses TV to brainwash the population when his TV breaks.
Instead of fixing it, he begins to think for himself.
He then breaks Mary King's TV to try and get her to think for herself but is caught by two police officers.

answer: In the year 2175, the citizens of the New World are brainwashed and apathetic. When George's T.V. breaks, he awakens to his own feelings and starts to rebel. He warns a new co-worker of the injustices of the government and encourages her to think for herself. He is caught and arrested by police; however, his courage inspires the new co-worker to begin questioning the system.

text: Exceeds the 3-sentence summary requirement. Merge sentences 2 - 4.

refinement:
In the year 2175, the citizens of the New World are brainwashed and apathetic.
When George's T.V. breaks, he awakens to his own feelings and starts to rebel, warning a new co-worker of the injustices of the government.
He encourages her to think for herself, but is caught and arrested by police; however, his courage inspires the new co-worker to begin questioning the system.

answer: The story is set in 2175 in a dystopian country with emotionless inhabitants, where the government has stripped its people of all emotion. George Huxley begins to feel happiness, something he has never felt before, but has to hide it to avoid being caught. Finally, on Ms. Mary King's first day of work at the food and drink restaurant, he tells her the truth and encourages her to think for herself instead of blindly following authority. In the process they are caught by two police officers.

text: "country with emotionless inhabitants, where the government has stripped its people of all emotion." - this seems redundant. Replace "emotion" with "ambition" and add the government is using TV to brainwash people.

refinement:
The story is set in 2175 in a dystopian country with emotionless inhabitants, where the government has stripped its people of all ambition using television as a brainwashing tool.
George Huxley begins to feel happiness, something he has never felt before, but has to hide it to avoid being caught.
Finally, on Ms. Mary King's first day of work at the food and drink restaurant, he tells her the truth and encourages her to think for herself instead of blindly following authority.
In the process they are caught by two police officers.

text:
"George Huxley begins to feel happiness, something he has never felt before, but has to hide it to avoid being caught." - must explain why (his TV broke).
"before," - Remove the comma

refinement:
The story is set in 2175 in a dystopian country with emotionless inhabitants, where the government has stripped its people of all ambition using television as a brainwashing tool.
George Huxley's TV unexpectedly breaks and he begins to feel happiness, something he has never felt before but has to hide it to avoid being caught.
Finally, on Ms. Mary King's first day of work at the food and drink restaurant, he tells her the truth and encourages her to think for herself instead of blindly following authority.
In the process they are caught by two police officers.

text: "he tells her the truth and encourages her to think for herself instead of blindly following authority." - must mention that he broke her TV, too.

refinement:
The story is set in 2175 in a dystopian country with emotionless inhabitants, where the government has stripped its people of all ambition using television as a brainwashing tool.
George Huxley's TV unexpectedly breaks and he begins to feel happiness, something he has never felt before but has to hide it to avoid being caught.
Finally, on Ms. Mary King's first day of work at the food and drink restaurant, he tells her the truth and breaks her TV to encourage her to think for herself instead of blindly following authority.
In the process they are caught by two police officers.

text: "In the process they are caught by two police officers." - delete this section to meet the 3-sentence summary requirement.

refinement:
The story is set in 2175 in a dystopian country with emotionless inhabitants, where the government has stripped its people of all ambition using television as a brainwashing tool.
George Huxley's TV unexpectedly breaks and he begins to feel happiness, something he has never felt before but has to hide it to avoid being caught.
Finally, on Ms. Mary King's first day of work at the food and drink restaurant, he tells her the truth and breaks her TV to encourage her to think for herself instead of blindly following authority.


text:
[U.S. Customs and Border Protection Form 6059B (arrival card)] [The Singapore embarkation card contains a warning to visitors about the death penalty. Warning signs are found at the Malaysia-Singapore border and all airports]

An ARRIVAL CARD, also known as an INCOMING PASSENGER CARD, LANDING CARD or DISEMBARKATION CARD, is a legal document used by immigration authorities of many countries to obtain information about incoming passenger not provided by the passenger's passport (such as health, criminal record, where they will be staying, purpose of the visit, etc.) and to provide a record of a person's entry into the country.[1][2][3][4] The card may also provide information on health and character requirements for non-citizens entering the country.[5] Some countries require an arrival card for each incoming passenger, while others require one card per family unit, and some only require an arrival card for non-citizens only.

Some countries, such as Singapore and Thailand, attach a departure card to the arrival card, which is retained in the alien's passport until their eventual departure. The arrival card can also be combined with a customs declaration, which some countries require incoming passengers to fill out separately.

Some countries, such as Malaysia,[6] do not require an arrival or departure card. The procedure of compiling information from immigration cards is no longer required by United States authorities following the introduction of the biometric recording system by the United States Customs and Border Protection.[7][8] There is minimal cross-border formality between a number of countries, most notably those in the passport-free travel area of Europe's Schengen Zone.[9] The US state of Hawaiʻi requires all visitors, even those on domestic flights, to fill out a card which is sent to the state's department of agriculture.[10]

The requirement to produce an arrival card is usually in addition to a requirement to produce a passport or other travel document, to obtain a visa, and sometimes complete a customs declaration.

Information on the card itself

The information requested varies by country. Typically the information requested on the arrival card includes:

-   Full name
-   Nationality
-   Date of birth
-   Passport number, place of issuance and expiration date
-   Flight number or name of aircraft, ship or vehicle
-   Purpose of trip: vacation, education/study, visiting relatives/families, business, diplomatic
-   Duration of stay
-   Destination (next stop of disembarkation)
-   Address in country
-   Information on items being bought into the country which may be of interest to customs and quarantine authorities

Travellers are generally required to sign, date, and declare the information is true, correct, and complete.

United Kingdom

Non-EEA citizens were formerly required to complete a landing card on entry to the United Kingdom. The traveller was required to present the completed form at the Border Force desk at the point of entry. The form was usually supplied by the airline, train or ferry company.[11]

In the UK, the landing card system was governed by the Immigration Act 1971, schedule 2 paragraph 5, which states;[12]

[13][14][15]

In August 2017, the UK Home Office announced that landing cards will be completely scrapped as part of digital border transformation and modernisation. It was expected this change would come into effect by the autumn.[16] Landing cards were abolished for all passengers effective 20 May 2019.[17]

Notably absent from the landing card was information on the purpose of the trip, destination, or any items brought into the country. Additional information requested from travellers was their occupation and the port of their last departure.[18][19][20]

[Border Force officers staff the UK border at London Heathrow Airport's Terminal 5, where landing cards were turned in]

[1] Passenger Cards. _Department of Immigration and Citizenship_. Australian Government.

[2] cbp.gov, What to Declare

[3]

[4] NZIS431 - New Zealand Passenger Departure Card . _Statistics New Zealand_.

[5] NZIS431 - New Zealand Passenger Departure Card. _Statistics New Zealand_.

[6] Malaysia no longer require immigration cards

[7]

[8] cbp.gov, US Citizens

[9] per Article 21 of the Schengen Borders Code (OJ L 105, 13 April 2006, p. 1).

[10]

[11] UK, gov.uk, Entering the UK

[12] International scholarship guide, 7 Things to do before your planes lands and once you alight at a UK International Airport

[13] Children & Immigration By Jeremy Rosenblatt, Ian Lewis, page 88

[14] Immigration Law Handbook, 2013, By Margaret Phelan, James Gillespie, page 50

[15] parliament.uk, Nationality, Immigration and Asylum Bill, 172.6

[16] Outdated landing cards to be withdrawn as part of digital border transformation

[17]

[18] UK Landing Card, pic

[19] UK Landing Card, pic

[20] go2london.co.uk, Do you need a Visa to go to London?

title: Arrival card

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the use of arrival cards in the United States?

answer: The United States does not require announcements nor arrival cards for international visitors.

text: This is correct but it is missing the fact that such cards have been eliminated due to Biometric standards.

refinement: The United States does not require announcements nor arrival cards for international visitors. It has previously, but with the new biometric recording system of the United States Customs and Border Protection it is no longer necessary. The state of Hawaii however still requires them, even for domestic flights.

answer: The US uses an arrival card for incoming passengers for the purposes of collecting information about incoming passengers not provided in a passenger's passport, such as health, criminal record, where they will be staying, and purpose of visit. The card is sometimes combined with a customs declaration which some countries require incoming passengers to fill out. The card is usually required in addition to having a passport and sometimes completing a customs declaration. While the card is mainly used to collect information, in the UK, the landing card no longer exists due to changes in digital border transformation and modernization.

text: The entirety of this passage is false

refinement: The United States does not require announcements nor arrival cards for international visitors. It has previously, but with the new biometric recording system of the United States Customs and Border Protection it is no longer necessary. The state of Hawaii however still requires them, even for domestic flights.

answer: According to the passage, an arrival card is used by U.S. Customs and Border Protection as a legal document to obtain information about incoming passengers not provided by the passenger's passport. The information requested on the arrival card typically includes full name, nationality, date of birth, passport number, place of issuance and expiration date, flight number or name of aircraft, ship or vehicle, purpose of trip, duration of stay and destination. Travellers are required to sign, date and declare the information. The requirement to produce an arrival card is in addition to the requirement to produce a passport and sometimes complete a customs declaration. Landing cards for all passengers were abolished effective May 2019.

text: This interpolates information from the UK and fails to answer the question.

refinement: According to the passage, an arrival card is used by U.S. Customs and Border Protection as a legal document to obtain information about incoming passengers not provided by the passenger's passport.

text: This is factually the opposite of the case. Arrival cards are no longer used.

refinement: The United States does not require announcements nor arrival cards for international visitors. It has previously, but with the new biometric recording system of the United States Customs and Border Protection it is no longer necessary. The state of Hawaii however still requires them, even for domestic flights.

answer: No answer

answer: An arrival card provides in-depth information about an immigrant visiting or entering their country, which cannot be found in their passport. The information requested, which varies by country, includes the reason for visit, passport number, issuance and expiration date, address in the country, duration of stay, etc. However, the United States no longer require an arrival or departure card when entering or leaving the country because the United States Customs Border Protection introduced a biometrics system, which provides them with the necessary details.

text: This information is irrelevant because no definition of arrival cards is necessary.

refinement: However, the United States no longer require an arrival or departure card when entering or leaving the country because the United States Customs Border Protection introduced a biometrics system, which provides them with the necessary details.

text: Remove the word however and add information about Hawaii

refinement: The United States no longer requires an arrival or departure card when entering or leaving the country because the United States Customs Border Protection introduced a biometrics system, which provides them with the necessary details. The state of Hawaii however still requires them, even for domestic flights.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the abolishment of landing cards in the UK?

answer: They are no longer required to enter the UK, and the landing cards that were previously used have been completely scrapped. This change is an upward movement to modernize the British customs practices.

text: Add information about the EEA

refinement: Initially, the UK required that all non-EEA citizens fill out a landing card, which typically contained details about the traveller on arrival into the UK. This form, supplied by the airline, train or ferry companies depending on which means of transport the traveller uses, was expected to be presented to the Border Force desk on arrival. However, they are no longer required to enter the UK, and the landing cards that were previously used have been completely scrapped. This change is an upward movement to modernize the British customs practices.

answer: Initially, the UK required that all non-EEA citizens fill out a landing card, which typically contained details about the traveller on arrival into the UK. This form, supplied by the airline, train or ferry companies depending on which means of transport the traveller uses, was expected to be presented to the Border Force desk on arrival. However, in August 2017, the UK decided to go digital by announcing that they planned to abolish the landing cards since every traveller's details will be logged on a system. Following this, the cards were officially scrapped on the 20th of May 2019.

answer: Beginning August 2017, the UK Home Office announced that landing cards will be completely scrapped. Landings cards were abolished effective 20 May 2019.

text: Add information about the EEA.

refinement: Initially, the UK required that all non-EEA citizens fill out a landing card, which typically contained details about the traveller on arrival into the UK. This form, supplied by the airline, train or ferry companies depending on which means of transport the traveller uses, was expected to be presented to the Border Force desk on arrival. Beginning August 2017, the UK Home Office announced that landing cards will be completely scrapped. Landings cards were abolished effective 20 May 2019.

answer: The landing cards have been completely scrapped as of May 2019. The reason for abolishment of this document was the digital border transformation, a modernization of the system in order to better accommodate those visiting the UK. Due to this abandonment of the document, border formalities between countries have been simplified.

text: Add information about the EEA

refinement: Initially, the UK required that all non-EEA citizens fill out a landing card, which typically contained details about the traveller on arrival into the UK. This form, supplied by the airline, train or ferry companies depending on which means of transport the traveller uses, was expected to be presented to the Border Force desk on arrival. The landing cards have been completely scrapped as of May 2019. The reason for abolishment of this document was the digital border transformation, a modernization of the system in order to better accommodate those visiting the UK. Due to this abandonment of the document, border formalities between countries have been simplified.

answer: Effective 20 May 2019, landing cards were abolished effective for all passengers in the UK. This change marks an end to the practice of compiling information from immigration cards.

text: Add information about the EEA

refinement: Initially, the UK required that all non-EEA citizens fill out a landing card, which typically contained details about the traveller on arrival into the UK. This form, supplied by the airline, train or ferry companies depending on which means of transport the traveller uses, was expected to be presented to the Border Force desk on arrival. Effective 20 May 2019, landing cards were abolished effective for all passengers in the UK. This change marks an end to the practice of compiling information from immigration cards.


text:
We are connected, you and I. I never knew you, but we are connected. I waited for you. I chose you. It could have been someone else. Just five more seconds and you would have passed, but you came around the building and I knew. It was the itch. The itch that’s deep inside. I’m sure you’ve had it yourself. The kind of itch you can never dig out. Trust me I tried. The first time I got the itch it felt like my stomach was being eaten from the inside out. So I took my knife and dug into my own flesh. But the deeper I went I realized I couldn’t reach it. When they found me with the black hole in my stomach, they thought you did it to me. They told me I was a lucky bastard and said I’d have a chance to get even with you soon enough. They told me I would live. So they patched me up and gave me pills, but I knew the itch would never go away. Now it calls me, guides me. It guided me to you.

Please don’t think I’m a monster. I’m sure you would have done the same, wouldn’t you? I didn’t order you to show up when you did. I just do what I’m told, by the itch, and the itch chose you.

I let ten of you pass from one wall to the other. I watched as the first of you leaned around the corner. I could have sworn you saw me, but you didn’t. The first of you leaned around the corner and gave a hand signal and you all came pouring out like ants from a hole. So if you’re looking for someone to blame, blame the signal man, not me. He gave you that red star on your chest just as much as me.

The red star. Sometimes I wonder what it would be like to get a red star. I used to think about it all the time, but after a while I realized making it this far meant I never would. I still think about it, sometimes.

As I was saying, you came around the corner, and as soon as I saw you, I got the itch. What’s that? Why? Speak up, man! Why did I get the itch? If you have to ask that question, clearly I was wrong and you never had it. In short, I don’t know. I know that isn’t the answer you want to hear, but it’s the truth. I don’t know why the itch chose you. You look like a decent enough fellow. I didn't hate you when you came around the corner. Actually, I get the sense that we are similar.

But you came around the corner, and I didn’t feel much of anything, just that small seed of fear. Surely, if you don’t know what the itch is, you have to know the fear. Even now, with the red star on your chest, I still fear you. I know, it sounds stupid, but I do. Because I could be you. Because we’re connected you and I. Someday, someone might get the itch, and it will be me that gets a red star. But this time, you came around the corner, and I waited.

I know you want that red star to mean something. You hope that in some small way, that badge on your chest will make a difference, and you know what? I think it does. Maybe not in the final outcome, but inside, yes, I think it does because you can claim it as your own. You earned it. But not just for yourself. If this whole thing was only for ourselves, we wouldn’t be here, am I right? But we are connected, I know that much, and that’s how I know it means something.

Well, I better get going. Say, what’s that? That in your hand? May I? Oh wow, what a great picture. She, wow, she is really beautiful. And look at those kiddos. Hey their Chief you have a helluva good looking-oh, Jesus. Man, I’m sorry. Here, keep them in a safe place.

Take them.
Common take them!

Alright, look, I’ll just tuck them right in your pocket there. Man, don’t look at me like that. I told you it wasn’t my fault. Weren’t you listening to a single word I was saying? We’re connected. I waited just to be sure! The itch told me! Stop staring at me you sick bastard! I swear I’ll put another red star right in your damn forehead! Stop staring at me!

*Pop!*
It’s not my fault!
*Pop! Pop! Pop!*
***

The dead soldier’s face was unrecognizable by the time they stopped Private Anderson. The stock of his rifle was implanted in the side of the enemy soldier’s skull, but even without that final blow, Anderson managed to fire off a full clip into the man’s face and chest.

As recalled by Lieutenant Jeffries, Private Anderson was being restrained by three other soldiers when he arrived on the scene. The private’s face had gone pallid in the struggle, his lips blue and twisted into a hideous form. And he was screaming. Jeffries had heard plenty of screams in war, but nothing so primal, so pure. It was like Anderson spewed a patchwork quilt of sorrow, horror, and darkness over the men, and when it settled it found every nerve in their bodies and plucked it like a guitar string. Watching him lose it, they all felt cold. Because they knew it could be them, that they were connected. They could be drug away with spittle flying from their mouths screaming, “the itch!” Just like Anderson.

title: Short Story -The Itch (Honest feedback appreciated!)

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What is the narrator talking about?

answer: They are fighting afraid, their enemy is the other side squad.

text: the sentence is incoherent.

refinement: The narrator is fighting but afraid, his enemy is the other side squad.

text: The response does not explain that the narrator is trying to justify killing another man in battle.

refinement: The narrator is fighting but afraid, his enemy is the other side squad. The narrator tries to justify why he has to kill the enemy soldier.

answer: He is describing his enemy as someone who he finds can be him.

text: The sentence is incoherent.

text: The response does not explain that the narrator is trying to justify killing his enemy.

refinement: He is describing his enemy. He tries to justify killing the enemy soldier.

answer: The narrator is a soldier who is talking to another soldier who is about to die and he is explaining why he killed him.

answer: The narrator talks about the itch and how the urge to hurt himself and search for things deep within himself may end in a certain death even after the disturbance has been dealt with.

answer: The narrator is a soldier who is talking to another soldier who is about to die and he is explaining why he killed him. The soldier is talking about how he and the other soldier are connected.

answer: He is talking about how he and the other soldiers are connected.

text: The response does not explain that the narrator is trying to justify killing another man in battle.

refinement: He is talking about how he and the other soldiers are connected. The narrator tries to justify killing the enemy soldier.


text:
Warm ginger ale and a cold body. Good times.
            The day started out relatively normal. Alarm went off at five am. Punched the snooze button. Broke the fourth alarm clock this week. Slept in until eight. Woke up for real, looked at the bashed clock, looked at my watch, let loose a string of choice words. Tried to shave and put on pants at the same time. Got caught and nicked my ear. Opened my fridge, no food; only a sock. What the hell?
            Normally, I woulda got in my car, broken three speed limits on my way to the local deli, and gotten a sandwich. Instead, I got in my car, looked over to my passenger seat, threw up, and stumbled out of my car, now rancid with the smell of upchucked Pad Thai from last night, and a dead body.
            My first call to 911 ever happened that day as well. I had to call in a fire.
            I went to work like normal that day, except my commute involved a bike and a pissed off crossing guard. I was looking forward to spending an entire day of lying through my teeth to make sure some sorry bastard got twenty-five years instead of forty in the state penitentiary. Of course, it’s a little hard to make witnesses sweat when you keep thinking about the clean up job you’ll have to do on your car.
            I guess I won that day. Of course, society lost fifteen years of not having deal with some sociopath arsonist. I think his name was Noah. Heh.
            I wasn’t looking forward to going to my house that day. Can’t imagine why. Regardless, I stopped by the local grocery store to pick up some melons. She slapped me and stormed off, but at least I killed some time.
            The distinct smell of freshly cut grass hit my nose as I biked down a residential street. Out of the corner of my eye, I saw a shirtless man on his rider lawnmower. And this is supposed to be a residential area. I suppose his glistening d-cups were the ultimate sign of laziness. Sickening.
            After mentally flipping off Mr. Landscaper-Gone-Wild, I decided to stop by an old friend’s house. Jack and I go way back. Mr. Daniels has always been halfway decent to me, always cheering me up and getting me some great stories to tell his other patrons. I’d have had a great conversation with him too, but his doorman insisted I pay my tab. So much for boozing up.
            As I lit the torch, I sipped on the only drink I managed to get off the guy. I set my ginger ale aside, and watched as the first glimmers of the fire began to pop. I stood back, and savored the yells and smoke. Bellua would be pleased.
            I smirked as my fingers flew to pocket, pulled out my crap phone, and dialed 911. I breathed in, and reported the fire in the most civilian way I could.
            After getting to my house, I downed the rest of the drink. I’m sure the bartender wasn’t worried about the glass.
            I donned my latex gloves and surgical mask, and slowly pulled on the body’s arm. It came off. Dammit Bellua. I thought better of my initial plan, threw the arm back into the car, and shoved the body’s head down. I got into the driver’s seat. Bad idea. I got back out, got reacquainted with my lunch from that afternoon, and covered my nose with a section of fabric.
            The drive to the bog was one of the most refreshing drives I’d ever had. I began conversing with the body. It’s nice to have someone to listen, even if that someone was turning a nasty shade of green. I’m sure it wasn’t because of my story though.
            As I dumped the body, I noticed a perfectly square piece of skin missing from the back of the body’s head. Bellua’s rituals always creep me out. I stopped myself from befouling the interior of my car any further, and drove back to my house.
            After a long day’s work, I was ready to turn in. But I have work to do.
            I popped open the secret compartment of my car’s trunk, I reminisced about the first time I met Bellua. I used to be a mess, but Bellua gave me a purpose. Clean up his dirty work, and in return he would do the same for me. In exchange for getting stacks of green for reducing felons’ sentences, Bellua required that I dispose of his victims. What Bellua didn’t know at the time was that I’m more fucked up than he is.
            Bellua has a warped sense of justice. He thinks that by killing off the corrupt government officials, he can fix the system. I don’t give a shit about the system. I just wanna see it burn. That’s why I’ll play along with Bellua, until I have the resources to pull off my master plan.
            I was running low on accelerant. I took comfort in the fact that Bellua still hadn’t discovered my tools, but it was curious how I blew through a month’s worth is a week. No, I realized, it’s me. My fires are getting bigger.

title: Bellua (Original Short Story By Me) p.1 Fire

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about Bellua?

answer: The text describes Bellua as an arsonist who reincarnates corrupt government officials through fire. The speaker enjoys seeing fires caused by Bellua, but intends to one day use those fires to plan a coup against the system.

text: kills, not reincarnates

refinement: The text describes Bellua as an arsonist who kills corrupt government officials through fire. The speaker enjoys seeing fires caused by Bellua, but intends to one day use those fires to plan a coup against the system.

text: It is not stated that the speaker enjoys seeing fires caused by Bellua but intends to one day use those fires to plan a coup against the system.

refinement: The text describes Bellua as an arsonist who kills corrupt government officials through fire.

text: It is not stated that he kills them through fire.

refinement: The text describes Bellua as an arsonist who kills corrupt government officials.

text: It is omitted: Bellua thinks that by killing off the corrupt government officials, he can fix the system. He pays the narrator to dispose of his victims.

refinement: The text describes Bellua as an arsonist who kills corrupt government officials. Bellua thinks that by killing off them, he can fix the system. He pays the narrator to dispose of his victims.

text: Bellua is not an arsonist, the narrator is.

refinement: The text describes Bellua who kills corrupt government officials. Bellua thinks that by killing off them, he can fix the system. He pays the narrator to dispose of his victims.

answer: Bellua is a serial killer who punishes corrupt government officials by burning them alive. He recruits the narrator when the narrator gets caught. The narrator gets burned alive as well if they try to tell Bellua is killing the wrong victims. Bellua believes that by killing corrupt government officials, he can fix the system.

text: It is incorrect that the narrator gets caught and burned alive as well if they try to tell Bellua is killing the wrong victims.

refinement: Bellua is a serial killer who punishes corrupt government officials by burning them alive. Bellua believes that by killing corrupt government officials, he can fix the system.

text: It is incorrect that Bellua burns the victims alive.

refinement: Bellua is a serial killer who punishes corrupt government officials. Bellua believes that by killing corrupt government officials, he can fix the system.

text: It is omitted that Bellua pays the narrator to dispose of his victims.

refinement: Bellua is a serial killer who punishes corrupt government officials. Bellua believes that by killing corrupt government officials, he can fix the system. Bellua pays the narrator to dispose of his victims.

answer: The narrator says that Bellua has a warped sense of justice and believes he can fix the government by killing corrupt officials. The narrator describes a mutually beneficial relationship with Bellua, in which Bellua helps the narrator win cases and the narrator disposes of Bellua's victims. The narrator also notes that Bellua has a ritual of cutting a square patch of skin from the back of his victims' heads.

answer: Bellua is an insane man who believes he's doing the right thing. Originally, he only killed corrupt bureaucrats, but eventually burned buildings with no repercussions at all. He enticed Colin, the narrator in this story, with a deal in which Colin could make money by making him look good in court. The premise was that he would kill people at a humane rate for the narrator, and in return, the narrator would kill his victims and dispose of the bodies. Colin judged the sentence when possible, but disobeyed at same time by causing a bigger fire every time.

text: It is not stated that Bellua burned buildings with no repercussions at all.

refinement: Bellua is an insane man who believes he's doing the right thing. He kills killed corrupt bureaucrats. He enticed Colin, the narrator in this story, with a deal in which Colin could make money by making him look good in court. The premise was that he would kill people at a humane rate for the narrator, and in return, the narrator would kill his victims and dispose of the bodies. Colin judged the sentence when possible, but disobeyed at same time by causing a bigger fire every time.

text: It is not stated that the narrator's name is Colin.

refinement: Bellua is an insane man who believes he's doing the right thing. He kills killed corrupt bureaucrats. He enticed the narrator with a deal in which they could make money by making him look good in court. The premise was that he would kill people at a humane rate for the narrator, and in return, the narrator would kill his victims and dispose of the bodies. The narrator judged the sentence when possible, but disobeyed at same time by causing a bigger fire every time.

text: It is not stated that Bellua is insane

refinement: Bellua believes he's doing the right thing. He kills killed corrupt bureaucrats. He enticed the narrator with a deal in which they could make money by making him look good in court. The premise was that he would kill people at a humane rate for the narrator, and in return, the narrator would kill his victims and dispose of the bodies. The narrator judged the sentence when possible, but disobeyed at same time by causing a bigger fire every time.

text: It is not stated: He enticed the narrator with a deal in which they could make money by making him look good in court. The premise was that he would kill people at a humane rate for the narrator, and in return, the narrator would kill his victims and dispose of the bodies. The narrator judged the sentence when possible, but disobeyed at same time by causing a bigger fire every time.

refinement: Bellua believes he's doing the right thing. He kills killed corrupt bureaucrats.

text: It is omitted that Bellua pays the narrator to dispose of his victims.

refinement: Bellua believes he's doing the right thing. He kills killed corrupt bureaucrats. He pays the narrator to dispose of his victims.

answer: Bellua is an arsonist whose actions lead to chaos and destruction. He has warped views on justice, believing that murder and destruction are the solutions to fixing the system. The narrator agrees to dispose of Bellua's victims in exchange for financial gain. The narrator is more corrupt than Bellua, wishing to see the system burn rather than improve. The narrator is also responsible for causing increased destruction through increased fire intensity.

text: It is not accurate that Bellua is an arsonist whose actions

refinement: Bellua has warped views on justice, believing that murder and destruction are the solutions to fixing the system. The narrator agrees to dispose of Bellua's victims in exchange for financial gain. The narrator is more corrupt than Bellua, wishing to see the system burn rather than improve. The narrator is also responsible for causing increased destruction through increased fire intensity.

text: It is inaccurate that Bellua is corrupt.

refinement: Bellua has warped views on justice, believing that murder and destruction are the solutions to fixing the system. The narrator agrees to dispose of Bellua's victims in exchange for financial gain. The narrator wishes to see the system burn rather than improve. The narrator is also responsible for causing increased destruction through increased fire intensity.