text:
 Monday, 7:00 am
The past couple of days have felt slightly... off. Although, I can't explain exactly what it feels like on paper. The best analogy I can possibly generate: everything just feels slightly tinted. The kind of tint that needs to be washed away. But how could this happen? I tried retracing steps countless times; yet nothing jumps out at me. It's the same as it's always been. I wake up at exactly 6:30 and let the alarm ring itself 10 times. I then walk over to the bathroom, making sure that I don't take any more or less than 10 steps to get there.

 I know, it seems strange so far but it's really not that bad. Afterwards, I take the towel off of the shower rod, unfold it; then refold it again and set it back on the shower rod. I routinely proceed to slide the shower curtain to the left, I then step into the shower, and slide the curtain back over to the right making sure to spread it out equally so that no water can escape. Now, I think this might be where everything went wrong. I pulled the shower handle outwards to turn the water on; then turned it all the way to the left. Except there was one thing that didn't fit the puzzle. What could it be though? I've been sitting here trying to figure it out for over 10 minutes now, I still can't put my finger on what it is. Anyways, it's almost 7:30 now; I should probably leave to go to work.

Monday, 5:30 pm

It all makes sense to me now, how could I have been so blind before? While I was walking my way to work; making sure to fit exactly 2 steps in every concrete square on the sidewalk, the solution had finally presented itself to me. It was that damned shower. I had forgotten to make sure that I turned the handle to the left until it clicked. I guess I must have just imagined that I turned it all the way. That makes perfect sense, and it also explains why the water had felt less scalding than it usually does. I'm such an idiot sometimes.
Well, I suppose there's no need for me to write about this anymore. I'm just glad that I can at last wash the tint away.

Tuesday, 7:00 am

No, this cannot be happening to me. The tint is still here. To make matters worse, I think the tint is darker than it was to start with. Maybe I'm just exaggerating, I don't even know what to do anymore. There isn't anything else that could have gone wrong besides the shower, I'm absolutely sure of it. After the shower, the only other part of the routine worth considering is getting dressed. For most people, choosing the right outfit for the day seems to be the hardest part of the morning. For me, it's the least methodical thing I do. Same black dress pants and blue dress shirt every single day. Oh, and of course the pen. I don't know if it's really worth mentioning, but before I walk out of the door I make sure to grab the pen off of the kitchen counter. I have an office job, so it comes in handy. I click it in and back out three times then put it on my dress shirt's chest pocket before leaving to go to work.

No, It's no use, none of those small routines could have been messed up. I'm now more scared than I've ever been before, and I can't help but think: what happens when the tint gets even darker?
I need to pull myself together, it's almost 7:30 now; I should probably leave to go to work.

Tuesday, 3:30 pm

My boss fired me today. He claims that I'm "Completely psychotic." It's strange, I don't know what made me drive the pen into his throat, but I'm so glad that I did. The smile has yet to leave my face. I can hardly believe it, I feel the tint starting to fade away.

P.S. To whomever finds this short journal, don't mind the blood on this last page.

I couldn't find any other pen to write with.

title: Tint

question: Summarize the narrator's Monday morning.

answer: The narrator wakes up and follows a set routine, until the shower time. Unbeknownst to the narrator, their routine had gone wrong. They didn't turn the water handle to the left all the way until it clicks, which caused the water to be less scalding than usual. The narrator's boss fires them, but they're finally relieved to find that the "tint" is starting to fade away.

text: Some parts of this response are found later on in the passage, and are not part of the narrator's Monday morning.

refinement: The narrator wakes up and follows a set routine, until the shower time. Unbeknownst to the narrator, their routine had gone wrong. They didn't turn the water handle to the left all the way until it clicks, which caused the water to be less scalding than usual.

answer: The narrator begins their morning like usual, starting with waking up at the regular time, walking to the bathroom and showering. However, it seems that they missed a detail, which is that they had not turned the shower handle all the way to the left, causing water to not be as hot as normal. This mistake explains why the narrator's daily routine felt "tinted". They also gets fired from work, but appears to be elated about it. Once they realize the tint is starting to fade away, they seem to be overjoyed.

text: This response includes details that were not part of the narrator's Monday morning and should be omitted.

refinement: The narrator begins their morning like usual, starting with waking up at the regular time, walking to the bathroom and showering. However, it seems that they missed a detail, which is that they had not turned the shower handle all the way to the left, causing water to not be as hot as normal. This mistake explains why the narrator's daily routine felt "tinted".

answer: The narrator wakes up around 6:30 and then walks to the bathroom making sure it doesn't take more than 10 steps. He then takes the towel off the shower rod, folds it, and places it back again. He then shifts the shower curtain from the left to the right and takes a shower. By 7:30 he leaves for work.

question: What doesn't feel right about his Monday morning?

text: There is no response to this question.

refinement: The narrator does not know what feels off about his Monday morning, just has a feeling things are off.

answer: After he pulls the shower handle outwards to turn the water on, he turns the handle all the way to the left. Something there didn't feel right. The narrator sat in the shower for 10 minutes trying to figure out what went wrong but could not figure.

text: There is no response to this question.

refinement: The narrator does not know what is wrong about his Monday morning until later in his day, when he realizes he didn't put his shower handle all the way to the left, and the water felt less scorching hot.

question: Does the narrator realize what went wrong during the shower on Monday?

answer: Yes, the narrator recognises that they forgot to turn the shower handle to the left until it clicked, which is what caused the milder water and the tint. However, it is not until the pen incident at work on Tuesday that the narrator truly realises what was wrong; they had not turned the shower handle all the way to the left.

text: A part of this response is inaccurate and needs to be fixed. It was not until the pen incident at work on Tuesday that the narrator realized that the shower handle hadn't been turned all the way to the left.

refinement: Yes, the narrator recognizes that they forgot to turn the shower handle to the left until it clicked, which is what caused the milder water and the tint. Later the Monday evening, the narrator realized  they had not turned the shower handle all the way to the left.

answer: Yes, the narrator realizes that they had forgotten to turn the shower handle to the left, causing the water to feel less scalding and leaving the tint in the surrounding environment. The narrator is relieved when they find out that they were fired from work, as they believe it means that the tint is starting to fade away.

text: Some parts of this response need to be omitted as it has nothing to do with answering the question given.

refinement: Yes, the narrator realizes that they had forgotten to turn the shower handle to the left, causing the water to feel less scalding and leaving the tint in the surrounding environment.

answer: While walking to work on Tuesday, the narrator realizes what he had forgotten. It struck him that he hadn't turned the shower handle all the way to the left until it clicked.

text: Replacing Tuesday to Monday helps make the response stronger.

refinement: While walking to work on Monday, the narrator realizes what he had forgotten. It struck him that he hadn't turned the shower handle all the way to the left until it clicked.

question: Does the narrator's tint go?

answer: No, the following day his tint gets worse, or so he believes.

text: The response given is not accurate, the narrator's tint starts to fade once he is fired.

refinement: Yes, the tint starts to fade after the narrator has been fired from his job.

answer: No, the narrator's tint is permanent. Although, after they stab their boss with a pen, the tint begins to fade away.

answer: No, the narrator's 'tint' remains throughout the passage. The narrator ultimately kills her boss and appears to feel better after the tint finally disappears.

question: Write a ~6 sentence summary.

answer: The narrator wakes up in the mornings, but the feel of everything is slightly off. They realize that trying to retrace steps is futile, and instead they go through their daily routine, doing everything but turning the shower handle to the left. Then one day they realize that they accidentally turned the handle to the right until it clicked. They do this every day until their boss is found dead after being stabbed by the narrator's pen. They acknowledge that the tension they felt must have been the darkening of the half-tint. The narrator is relieved to realize that they're not more psychotic than they thought.

text: Parts of this summary is out of context and the details are added inconsistently to how they occurred in the passage.

refinement: The narrator wakes up in the mornings, but the feel of everything is slightly off. They realize that trying to retrace steps is futile, and instead they go through their daily routine, doing everything but turning the shower handle to the left. Then one day they realize that they accidentally didn't turn the shower handle all the way to the left. One day, the narrator is fired by his boss and the narrator stabs the boss with their pen.

answer:
The narrator wakes up on Monday with a tint. He follows his usual morning routine but he feels like he has forgotten something. In the evening he realizes that he forgot to turn his shower handle all the way to the left till it clicked.

The next he wakes up with the tint again and goes to work. At work, his boss fires him claiming that he is "completely psychotic". The narrator had driven his pen into his boss's throat.

answer: The narrator painstakingly follows their every morning routine. They wake up at 6:30, let the alarm ring 10 times, then proceed to their shower; at 8:00 am, they make sure the shower handle is turned all the way to the left. Strangely, they realize once they are at work, that despite what seemed to be a flawless routine, they had received no shower. Returning home, they realize they had not turned the shower handle all the way to the right. Annoyed at this blunder, when the narrator goes to work the following day, they are fired by their boss who claims that they are "completely psychotic." But the narrator is glad that they succeeded in getting a watch of their boss' throat and drives the handle of a pen into it. They finally begin to thing that the tint has began to fade.

text: Some minor details in this response need to be changed.

refinement: The narrator painstakingly follows their every morning routine. They wake up at 6:30, let the alarm ring 10 times, then proceed to their shower; at 8:00 am, they make sure the shower handle is turned all the way to the left. Strangely, they realize once they are at work, that despite what seemed to be a flawless routine, they had received no shower. Returning home, they realize they had not turned the shower handle all the way to the left. Annoyed at this blunder, when the narrator goes to work the following day, they are fired by their boss who claims that they are "completely psychotic." But the narrator is glad that they succeeded in getting a watch of their boss' throat and drives the handle of a pen into it. They finally begin to thing that the tint has began to fade.

answer: The narrator is trying to figure out why everything feels tinted. They conclude that everything has gone wrong from turning on the shower. Before they go to work every morning, they make sure to grab a pen off the kitchen counter. They are fired from work after driving a pen into their boss's throat, and find that the tint is fading from their life. This happens after the shower, the only other portion of the routine they can't-figure-out. The narrator realizes the words imprinted on the pen: OXIDATION.

text: This response has a lot of incorrect details and details that are out of place from the happenings of the passage.

refinement: The narrator is trying to figure out why everything feels tinted. They conclude that everything has gone wrong from turning on the shower. Before they go to work every morning, they make sure to grab a pen off the kitchen counter. The narrator is fired from work and drives a pen into their boss's throat. The narrator finds that the tint is fading from their life after this event.

answer: For a week, the narrator has a tint on his routine. One day, he notices that one of the parts has gone wrong. He goes to work, but his boss fires him, claiming that he is psychotic. He takes out a pen from the office and puts it in his throat. He is a psychotic now because he has murdered his boss. At the end, he uses the blood from his boss and writes a note, encouraging the reader to not mind the blood.

answer:
The narrator is meticulous in how they do anything, specifically their morning routine. They neaten everything many times over on the carpet, the shower curtain, the towel, their clothes.
Reflecting on the morning's activities, they realize they turned their shower handle clockwise instead of counterclockwise. So when the water came on, it was burning hot. They missed a big detail!
They describe a lost feeling for awhile after, later shaking it off and going to work.
At work, the narrator describes being laid off by their boss, who remarked that the narrator was psychotic.

text: This response has some incorrect details and incorrect event timing from the passage as well.

refinement:
The narrator is meticulous in how they do anything, specifically their morning routine. They neaten everything many times over on the carpet, the shower curtain, the towel, their clothes.
Reflecting on the morning's activities, they realize they didn't turn their shower handle all the way to the left. The narrators describes a lost feeling for awhile after, later shaking it off and going to work.
At work, the narrator describes being laid off by their boss, who remarked that the narrator was psychotic.


split: train

text:
*I made the guy the minute he walked into the park. He was trying to hide it, act chill, but I knew straight up that this was the guy I'd been on the phone to not an hour ago. I relaxed back on the bench, lit another cigarette and feigned in the local news section of the paper while I watched him through the smoke. He started forward, stopped, and tried not to look like a rabbit caught in headlights. The sports bag he held was pressed tightly to his chest, and he eyed anyone who got within ten feet of him in case they might make a move for it. He drifted towards the pond across from me, as if to seem to anybody watching that maybe he spotted the person he was looking for on the other side. Pulled his phone from his pocket as though checking a text message. Ambled towards the bench I sat on in semi-circles. There's nothing more noticeable than someone trying not to act noticeable. He probably had the whole thing laid out in his head like some three-act play. His 'drama de non-chalance'. It was fucking hilarious, but tiring at the same time. I dont usually deal so much to new people, I like to deal with my regulars, and maybe the occasional transaction with a friend of a friend, but only when they come vouched for. In this case I made an exception, Malta Black is hot. I needed to move it as fast as possible.*

*After a few more minutes of aimless meandering like a newborn calf, he eventually worked up the courage to sit on the other end of the bench, sat stock straight, watching out across park where some college aged kids tossed a frisbee around under the trees. He spoke to me out of the corner of his mouth; "Ar-Are you Jones?". I folded my paper across my lap and turned to face him abruptly. "Yeah. Are we going to fucking deal or what? I have someplace to be". He recoiled in terror, tensed up, mouth agape and eyes darting, as if expecting the two Au-Pairs with strollers walking by to suddenly pull badges and guns and yell "Freeze! Motherfucker! The jigs up!". I frowned and shot him a 'Chill the fuck out' glare as I pulled the slim case from underneath the bench and popped it open between us.*

*"So Mark said you were in the market for some Malta Black?" I asked as I peeled back the wax sheets from the top of the product. "I need to know you're serious, because this shits not easy to move." The terror left him now, I could see the addict in him, the way his eyes lit up and telltale twitch of the lips when he saw it laid out in front of him like a veritable gold mine. He reached out to pick it up and I snapped the case shut, catching his fingers. "Money first, bud. You know how this works." He nodded as he fumbled his wallet out of his pocket. I continued "This is only the sample case. I have the whole shipment, 30 cases, like this, ready to go. You pay me now, I call our mutual buddy mark and he meets my guy later for the exchange. Cool?" He nodded again, lost for words. He was probably fantasizing about what he was going to do with that much Malta Black. Its a huge amount, even for a heavy addict, but thats not my problem. I just sell it, I don't tell them what to do with it.*

*He offered the sports bag, and I did a quick check to see it wasn't bills stacked on top of socks before I stood up slinging it over my should. "All looks good. You'll hear from mark this evening. If I get home and count this, and find you trying to cut me short, you'll hear from me before then. Personally. Otherwise you wont see me again. Understand?" He mumbled affirmation, transfixed on the case, gently caressing the corners with his fingers. I stubbed out my cigarette on the bench and left by the west st. entrance. Another deal done. Another day down. People say the hardest thing about dealing is not getting hooked yourself. But I've never understood the fascination of stamps.*

title: Short piece inspired by an off-hand comment in a thread on askreddit. Tell me what you think. (~700 words)

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the narrator and his role in the story?

answer: The narrator is a drug dealer who is approached by someone looking for Malta Black. The narrator acts professionally and assesses the potential customer's legitimacy. He ultimately accepts the customer's offer and sells him the product. The narrator makes it clear that he expects to be paid promptly and in full, and will seek retribution if he does not receive the correct amount. Though the narrator is a criminal, a part of him relishes the opportunity to challenge himself and "deal" with new people.

text: The narrator is not a drug dealer. He sells rare stamps.

refinement: The narrator is made out to be a dealer but really only sells illegal rare stamps. He is approached by someone looking for Malta Black. The narrator acts professionally and assesses the potential customer's legitimacy. He ultimately accepts the customer's offer and sells him the product. The narrator makes it clear that he expects to be paid promptly and in full, and will seek retribution if he does not receive the correct amount. Though the narrator is a criminal, a part of him relishes the opportunity to challenge himself and "deal" with new people.

answer: The narrator is Jones, a drug dealer. He wants to make a transaction with Mark, a buyer from earlier. The deal involves Mark procuring Malta Black from Jones. Mark had supposedly known Jones longer than Jones has known him because he vouched to be his friend's friend. The first impression Jones has of Mark is that he did all he can to hide, act chill, and do all that's in his power not to act noticeably. The thing that drew Jones' attention early on though was the bag, which pressed tightly to his chest, and the eyes that scanned around, alert.

text: The narrator is not a drug dealer. He merely sells rare collectible stamps illegally.

refinement: The narrator is Jones, a dealer who illegally sells rare stamps. He wants to make a transaction with Mark, a buyer from earlier. The deal involves Mark procuring Malta Black from Jones. Mark had supposedly known Jones longer than Jones has known him because he vouched to be his friend's friend. The first impression Jones has of Mark is that he did all he can to hide, act chill, and do all that's in his power not to act noticeably. The thing that drew Jones' attention early on though was the bag, which pressed tightly to his chest, and the eyes that scanned around, alert.

text: Mark is referenced incorrectly in the response. Mark is not the buyer. He is a mutual friend of Jones and the buyer.

refinement: The narrator is Jones, a dealer who illegally sells rare stamps. He wants to make a transaction with Mark's friend, a buyer. The deal involves Mark procuring Malta Black from Jones. Mark had supposedly known Jones longer than Jones has known him because he vouched to be his friend's friend. The first impression Jones has of Mark is that he did all he can to hide, act chill, and do all that's in his power not to act noticeably. The thing that drew Jones' attention early on though was the bag, which pressed tightly to his chest, and the eyes that scanned around, alert.

text: There is no mention of Mark being involved in the deal taking place in the story.

refinement: The narrator is Jones, a dealer who illegally sells rare stamps. He wants to make a transaction with Mark's friend, a buyer. Mark had supposedly known Jones longer than Jones has known him because he vouched to be his friend's friend. The first impression Jones has of Mark is that he did all he can to hide, act chill, and do all that's in his power not to act noticeably. The thing that drew Jones' attention early on though was the bag, which pressed tightly to his chest, and the eyes that scanned around, alert.

text: It does not make sense how Mark has personally known Jones longer than Jones has known him.

refinement: The narrator is Jones, a dealer who illegally sells rare stamps. He wants to make a transaction with Mark's friend, a buyer. The first impression Jones has of Mark is that he did all he can to hide, act chill, and do all that's in his power not to act noticeably. The thing that drew Jones' attention early on though was the bag, which pressed tightly to his chest, and the eyes that scanned around, alert.

text: Mark is Jones' friend. The person he is dealing with is not Mark.

refinement: The narrator is Jones, a dealer who illegally sells rare stamps. He wants to make a transaction with Mark's friend, a buyer. The first impression Jones has of his buyer is that he did all he can to hide, act chill, and do all that's in his power not to act noticeably. The thing that drew Jones' attention early on though was the bag, which pressed tightly to his chest, and the eyes that scanned around, alert.

answer: The narrator's name is Jones. He's in the park to meet a potential client. He already knows this client because he's been on the phone with him not an hour ago. He sells stamps of Maltese black, a drug which is very hot right now. The narrator doesn't want anybody to know he's dealing because he likes to keep it casual. However, Mark vouched for the narrator's buddy, telling him about a reliable supplier. He agreed to go to the park to hear a pitch from Jones, but he never expected him to try to negotiate with drugs upfront without knowing the quantity or rates. Now that he's here, he's trying to decide whether or not he should put trust in someone he doesn't really know. Jones senses this and asks for a show of trust. Even though Jones' buddy vouched for Jones, it seems he is trying to arrange for a buyer who can afford a big deal and pay a large sum.

text: The stamp itself is not a drug.

refinement: The narrator's name is Jones. He's in the park to meet a potential client. He already knows this client because he's been on the phone with him not an hour ago. He sells stamps of Maltese black. The narrator doesn't want anybody to know he's dealing because he likes to keep it casual. However, Mark vouched for the narrator's buddy, telling him about a reliable supplier. He agreed to go to the park to hear a pitch from Jones, but he never expected him to try to negotiate with drugs upfront without knowing the quantity or rates. Now that he's here, he's trying to decide whether or not he should put trust in someone he doesn't really know. Jones senses this and asks for a show of trust. Even though Jones' buddy vouched for Jones, it seems he is trying to arrange for a buyer who can afford a big deal and pay a large sum.

text: The text does not mention that Maltese Black is a rare stamp.

refinement: The narrator's name is Jones. He's in the park to meet a potential client. He already knows this client because he's been on the phone with him not an hour ago. He sells stamps of Maltese black, a rare stamp collection. The narrator doesn't want anybody to know he's dealing because he likes to keep it casual. However, Mark vouched for the narrator's buddy, telling him about a reliable supplier. He agreed to go to the park to hear a pitch from Jones, but he never expected him to try to negotiate with drugs upfront without knowing the quantity or rates. Now that he's here, he's trying to decide whether or not he should put trust in someone he doesn't really know. Jones senses this and asks for a show of trust. Even though Jones' buddy vouched for Jones, it seems he is trying to arrange for a buyer who can afford a big deal and pay a large sum.

answer: The narrator's name is Jones. He's a rare stamp dealer who is meeting someone addicted to stamps. Jones is trying to move 30 cases of Black Malta, and the buyer he's meeting in the park is interested. He never understood other people's fascination with stamps.

answer: The narrator is a drug dealer who made an exception for a new addict and agreed to exchange a large quantity of narcotics for cash. While he tries to maintain an air of business savvy, the new addict fills him with amusement. The narrator's main concern is getting the money up front and making sure the addict doesn't try to cheat him. The narrator seems to assume the role of expert in trafficking this type of product, with little concern for the potential consequences of his actions.

text: The narrator is not a drug dealer but a mover of rare stamp collections.

refinement: The narrator is an unlicensed stamp dealer who made an exception for a new addict and agreed to exchange a large quantity of narcotics for cash. While he tries to maintain an air of business savvy, the new addict fills him with amusement. The narrator's main concern is getting the money up front and making sure the addict doesn't try to cheat him. The narrator seems to assume the role of expert in trafficking this type of product, with little concern for the potential consequences of his actions.

text: His buyer is not an actual addict.

refinement: The narrator is an unlicensed stamp dealer who made an exception for a new buyer and agreed to exchange a large quantity of narcotics for cash. While he tries to maintain an air of business savvy, the new buyer fills him with amusement. The narrator's main concern is getting the money up front and making sure the buyer doesn't try to cheat him. The narrator seems to assume the role of expert in trafficking this type of product, with little concern for the potential consequences of his actions.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about Mark's role in the story?

answer: The text clearly indicates that Mark is the connection between the protagonist and the protagonist's client. The protagonist doesn't have much interest in dealing with new people and accepts the assignment for Malta Black only because the client is hot. Mark primarily serves as an intermediary between the protagonist and their client.

text: The narrator does not believe that his new client is hot.

refinement: The text clearly indicates that Mark is the connection between the protagonist and the protagonist's client. The protagonist doesn't have much interest in dealing with new people and accepts the assignment for Malta Black only because the Malta Black stamps are hot. Mark primarily serves as an intermediary between the protagonist and their client.

answer: The text portrays Mark as someone who connects buyers and sellers of illegal goods. The character of the buyer is portrayed as inexperienced, timid and easily spooked.

text: Mark does not connect buyers and sellers. He is simply a mutual friend between the narrator and the buyer.

refinement: The text portrays Mark as someone who connects the buyer and the narrator of illegal goods. The character of the buyer is portrayed as inexperienced, timid and easily spooked.

answer: Mark is a mutual contact of Jones and the buyer he met at the park. Jones uses Mark as an intermediary and is tasked to call the buyer if the payment is complete. Mark is also supposed to meet with Jones' guy for the exchange if the money checks out.

answer: Mark acts like a messenger between the prospective buyer and Jones, who is selling the Malta black. Mark is actually not a dealer. He knows others who want to buy drugs. He has given Jones the contact details of the expert he made friends with.

text: There are no drugs involved in the story. They were only dealing rare stamps.

refinement: Mark acts like a messenger between the prospective buyer and Jones, who is selling the Malta black. Mark is actually not a dealer. He knows others who want to buy rare stamps. He has given Jones the contact details of the expert he made friends with.

answer: Mark is the mutual friend of the money guy and the narrator, Jones. Mark connects the two because the narrator can't sell his Malt Black on the market due to high demand. Mark is also the one who vouches for the money guy. The narrator is someone who satisfies the demands of people like Mark and the money guy when their demands are predicted to be fulfilled. While he does supply them with something everyone wants, the narrator does caution that that the drug is not easy to come by, hence he must be vigilant about safeguarding his supply.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about Malta Black?

answer: Malta Black is presumably a rare stamp collection. It is hot and Jones needs to move it as fast as possible. However, Jones is sitting on 30 cases of Malta Black, making it hard to move.

answer: Malta Black is a highly addictive narcotic, and the person in the story views it as something to be sold and eventually used by another person. He knows that this product is difficult to obtain, and has no sympathy for the potential users.

text: Malta Black is a stamp collection, not a drug.

refinement: Malta Black is a rare stamp collection, and the person in the story views it as something to be sold and eventually used by another person. He knows that this product is difficult to obtain, and has no sympathy for the potential users.

answer:
The story mentions Malta Black as a cocaine analogue. The particular brand of Malta Black that Jones sold in the story, was hot and needed to be moved as soon as possible, hence Jones allowed people to presume that he was desperate and allured them.
Jones, who sold drugs, announced that he was in the market for some Malta Black. He has a shipment of 30 cases and he doesnt just sell to people, he lets them cut the shipment and leaves them with so much that the drug is not scarce.
Meanwhile, Jones has the means and the backbone not to be influenced by the drug.

text: The Malta Black is a stamp collection, not a drug.

refinement:
The story mentions Malta Black as a cocaine analogue but it is actually a rare stamp collection. The particular brand of Malta Black that Jones sold in the story, was hot and needed to be moved as soon as possible, hence Jones allowed people to presume that he was desperate and allured them.
Jones announced that he was in the market for some Malta Black. He has a shipment of 30 cases and he doesnt just sell to people, he lets them cut the shipment and leaves them with so much that the stamp is not scarce.
Meanwhile, Jones has the means and the backbone not to be influenced by the stamp.

answer: Malta Black is described as a hot product the dealer needs to sell at all costs. The dealer reveals that there are threads dealers who rip off buyers by selling them something different. However, the dealer urges his buyer to pay upfront assuring that he would call 'our mutual buddy' to deliver Malta Black as he has the full shipment. The buyer shows absolute excitement when he sees the product laid out in front of him. It is revealed that Malta Black is a collection of stamps and the dealer is only a small fry. Dealers are known to flock pennies to the teet of their clients but the dealer assures his buyer that the full money will not be cut short. However, the buyer cannot be trusted as he would cut the dealer's profit.

answer: Malta Black is a highly addictive drug sought after by an addict. The dealer in the story makes a point to check for any possible fraud before exchanging the drug for cash, warning the potential buyer about what will happen if he tries to get cheated.

text: Malta Black is not a drug but a collection of stamps.

refinement: Malta Black is a collection of rare stamps sought after by buyers/collectors. The dealer in the story makes a point to check for any possible fraud before exchanging the stamps for cash, warning the potential buyer about what will happen if he tries to get cheated.


text:
JEFFREY SCOTT RAIKES (born May 29, 1958) is the co-founder of the Raikes Foundation. He retired from his role as the chief executive officer of the Bill & Melinda Gates Foundation in 2014.[1] He serves on the boards of Giving Tech Labs,[2] Hudl[3] Costco Wholesale,[4] the Jeffrey S. Raikes School of Computer Sciences and Management at the University of Nebraska-Lincoln,[5] and the Microsoft Alumni Network. He is Chair of the Stanford University Board of Trustees.[6] Until early 2008, Raikes was the President of the Microsoft Business Division and oversaw the Information Worker, Server & Tools Business and Microsoft Business Solutions Groups.[7] He joined Microsoft in 1981 as a product manager.[8] He retired from Microsoft in September 2008, after a transitional period, to join the Gates Foundation.[9] He also held roles managing the company's sales force and services groups.

Early life

Raikes grew up in Ashland, Nebraska, graduating from Ashland-Greenwood High School in 1976. Raikes prepared to work for the US Department of Agriculture on agricultural policy while earning his Bachelor of Science degree in Engineering-Economics Systems (EES) from Stanford University.[10] It was while at Stanford that Raikes had his first exposure to computing, learning Pascal on a DEC System 20. The first computer he bought was an Apple II, which he used to help his brother, Ron Raikes, manage the family farm.

Career

He joined Apple Computer as the VisiCalc Engineering Manager in 1980. He worked at Apple for 15 months before being recruited to Microsoft by Steve Ballmer in 1981 as a product manager. He was promoted to director of Applications Marketing in 1984 and was the chief strategist behind Microsoft's investments in graphical applications for the Apple Macintosh and the Microsoft Windows operating system. In this role, he drove the product strategy and design of Microsoft Office. Raikes was promoted to vice president of Office Systems, where he was responsible for development and marketing of word processing, workgroup applications and pen computing.[11]

He later held roles managing North American operations, and worldwide sales, marketing, and services. In 2000, he was appointed to lead Productivity and Business Services, which later became the Information Worker business at Microsoft. He was named a company president in 2005.

Philanthropy

Raikes has a wide range of philanthropic interests. He and his wife are co-founders of the Raikes Foundation. He is a trustee at the University of Nebraska Foundation, funded a professorship in agronomy, and was a designer of the University of Nebraska–Lincoln Jeffrey S. Raikes School of Computer Science and Management. He has been active in United Way for several years. In 2006–2007, he co-chaired the annual campaign of United Way of King County with his wife, setting a national record for funds raised. On 2008-05-12 it was announced that Raikes would replace Patty Stonesifer as the CEO of the Bill & Melinda Gates Foundation;[12] he stepped down in 2014.[13]

He is a major donor to the Center for Comparative Studies in Race and Ethnicity (CCSRE) at Stanford University where he also established the Jeff and Tricia Raikes Undergraduate Scholarship Fund to ensure that students admitted to Stanford from rural and inner-city schools have an opportunity to attend the university. He was chosen as a trustee of Stanford University in 2012 and in 2017 was elected chair.[14][15]

In 1992 the Pacific Northwest was in danger of losing the Seattle Mariners Major League Baseball franchise. Raikes joined with other local business leaders to purchase the team, keeping them “safe at home” for the enjoyment of Northwest baseball fans.[16]

In June 2008, Raikes donated approximately $10 million to the University of Nebraska's JD Edwards Honors Program, which officially changed its name to the Jeffrey S. Raikes School of Computer Science and Management shortly thereafter.

In July 2017, Jeff Raikes and his wife Tricia Raikes inspired the creation of Giving Tech Labs and joined their board.

Personal life

Raikes and his wife, Tricia Raikes née McGinnis, have three children: Michaela, Connor, and Gillian.

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title: Jeff Raikes

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about Jeff Raikes' philanthropic interests?

answer: Jeff Raikes and his wife founded the Raikes Foundation. He has been active in United Way for several years and set a national record for funds raised in 2006-2007. He was the CEO of the Bill & Melinda Gates Foundation. He is a major donor to the Center for Comparative Studies in Race and Ethnicity (CCSRE) at Stanford University. Raikes donated approximately $10 million to the University of Nebraska's JD Edwards Honors Program in 2008.

answer: Raikes is a major donor to the Center for Comparative Studies in Race and Ethnicity of Stanford University, leading MSFT and the Bill & Melinda Gates Foundation to provide scholarships and other funds to students admitted to Stanford from rural and inner-city schools. He also headed up the purchase of the Seattle Mariners for $800 million after others in the community sought to relocate it.

text: Incomplete answer

refinement: Raikes is a co-founder of the Raikes Foundation along with his wife. He has been active in United Way for several years. He co-chaired the annual campaign of United Way of King County with his wife, setting a national record for funds raised. Raikes is a major donor to the Center for Comparative Studies in Race and Ethnicity of Stanford University, leading MSFT and the Bill & Melinda Gates Foundation to provide scholarships and other funds to students admitted to Stanford from rural and inner-city schools. He also headed up the purchase of the Seattle Mariners for $800 million after others in the community sought to relocate it.

answer: Raikes has a wide range of philanthropic interests. Though retired, he and his wife were co-founders of the Raikes Foundation. He is also a trustee at the University of Nebraska Foundation as well as a founder and designer of the University of Nebraska-Lincoln Jeffrey S. Raikes School of Computer Science and Management. He has also been active in United Way. He served as a major donor to the Center for Comparative Studies in Race and Ethnicity at Stanford University, where he also established the Jeff and Tricia Raikes Undergraduate Scholarship Fund. Raikes has also been instrumental in keeping the Seattle Mariners a local team, rescuing it from takeover.

answer: The article mentions that Raikes is involved in philanthropic interests including supporting the University of Nebraska Foundation, co-founding the Raikes Foundation, and giving to programs at Stanford University.

text: Incomplete

refinement: Raikes is a co-founder of the Raikes Foundation along with his wife. He has been active in United Way for several years. He co-chaired the annual campaign of United Way of King County with his wife, setting a national record for funds raised. Raikes is a major donor to the Center for Comparative Studies in Race and Ethnicity of Stanford University, leading MSFT and the Bill & Melinda Gates Foundation to provide scholarships and other funds to students admitted to Stanford from rural and inner-city schools. He also headed up the purchase of the Seattle Mariners for $800 million after others in the community sought to relocate it.

answer: The article describes Raikes' philanthropic interests as being wide-ranging. The Raikes Foundation he founded, as well as his support for the Jeffrey S. Raikes School of Computer Science and Management at the University of Nebraska-Lincoln and Stanford University, highlight his philanthropic interests in education and technology. He is also a donor to various local causes, such as helping to keep the Seattle Mariners baseball team in its home town.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about Raikes' career?

answer: Raikes started work at Apple and after 15 months, he was recruited by Ballmer to Microsoft. He was active in graphical applications for Apple Macintosh and Microsoft Windows. He was promoted to director of Application Marketing in 1984 and the chief strategist to Microsoft's investments in graphical applications. He was promoted to the vice president of Office Systems and later held roles managing North American operations, and worldwide sales and marketing. In 2005, he was appointed to lead Productivity and Business Services. He was named a company president in 2005. He retired from Microsoft in September 2008, to later join the Gates Foundation.

answer: Jeffrey Raikes joined Microsoft in 1981 as a product manager. He later held roles managing North American operations, and worldwide sales, marketing, and services. In 2000, he was appointed to lead Productivity and Business Services, which later became the Information Worker business at Microsoft. He was named a company president in 2005. Raikes retired from Microsoft in September 2008, after a transitional period, to join the Gates Foundation.

answer: Raike worked at Appleas the VisiCalc Engineering Manager then at Microsoft as a product manager. He designed Microsoft Office and was promoted to vice president of Office Systems.  He was appointed to lead Productivity and Business Service in 2000. He was named a company president in 2005.

answer: Raikes rose to the position of President of the Microsoft Business Division and oversaw the Information Worker and Business Solutions Groups. Additionally, he has been a major donor to institutions focused on education and on maintaining the Seattle Mariners Major League Baseball team.

text: This doesn't answer the question fully

refinement: Raikes was the President of the Microsoft Business Division and oversaw the Information Worker, Server & Tools Business and Microsoft Business Solutions Groups.[7] He joined Microsoft in 1981 as a product manager.[8] He retired from Microsoft in September 2008, after a transitional period, to join the Gates Foundation.[9] He also held roles managing the company's sales force and services groups.

answer: Raikes grew up in Nebraska, preparing for a career in agricultural protectionism. He studied Engineering-Economics Systems at Stanford University, where he had his first exposure to computing and bought his first computer, an Apple II. During his time at Apple, he conducted engineering management. He learned Pascal on a DEC System 20.

text: This fails to adequately answer the question

refinement: Raikes was the President of the Microsoft Business Division and oversaw the Information Worker, Server & Tools Business, and Microsoft Business Solutions Groups.[7] He joined Microsoft in 1981 as a product manager.[8] He retired from Microsoft in September 2008, after a transitional period, to join the Gates Foundation.[9] He also held roles managing the company's sales force and services groups.


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ELMWOOD TOWNSHIP is an inactive township in Saline County, in the U.S. state of Missouri.[1]

Elmwood Township was erected in 1870, taking its name from the community of Elmwood, Missouri.[2]

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title: Elmwood Township, Saline County, Missouri

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Where is the Elmwood Township?

answer: Elmwood Township is in Saline County, Missouri.

text: "ELMWOOD TOWNSHIP is an inactive township in Saline County, in the U.S. state of Missouri" is evidence of this answer.

answer: The township is in Saline County, Missouri.

text: "ELMWOOD TOWNSHIP is an inactive township in Saline County, in the U.S. state of Missouri" is evidence of this answer.

answer: Elmwood Township is located in Saline County, Missouri.

text: "ELMWOOD TOWNSHIP is an inactive township in Saline County, in the U.S. state of Missouri" is evidence of this answer.

answer: The Elmwood Township is located in Saline County, Missouri.

text: "ELMWOOD TOWNSHIP is an inactive township in Saline County, in the U.S. state of Missouri" is evidence of this answer.

answer: Saline County, Missouri

text: "ELMWOOD TOWNSHIP is an inactive township in Saline County, in the U.S. state of Missouri" is evidence of this answer.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

When was the township made?

answer: It was created in 1870.

text: "Elmwood Township was erected in 1870" is evidence that it was founded in 1870.

answer: In 1870.

text: "Elmwood Township was erected in 1870" is evidence that it was founded in 1870.

answer: The township of Elmwood was erected in 1870.

text: "Elmwood Township was erected in 1870" is evidence that it was founded in 1870.

answer: The township of Elmwood was made in 1870.

text: "Elmwood Township was erected in 1870" is evidence that it was founded in 1870.

answer: In 1870

text: "Elmwood Township was erected in 1870" is evidence that it was founded in 1870.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Does anyone live in the township?

answer: is not answered, but is a presumption in the question, no

text: "ELMWOOD TOWNSHIP is an inactive" is evidence that the town could possibly be barren.

answer: No.

text: There is no evidence supporting that no one lives in the town, only that it is inactive. While this technically means there is no mayor or deputy running the town, this does not necessarily mean that the town has no residents.

answer: No, Elmwood Township is inactive and there are no residents within the township.

text: There is no evidence supporting that no one lives in the town, only that it is inactive. While this technically means there is no mayor or deputy running the town, this does not necessarily mean that the town has no residents.

refinement: Possibly no, Elmwood Township is inactive.

answer: It is inactive.

text: It does not answer the question.

refinement: It is inactive and highly likely that no one lives there.

text: "ELMWOOD TOWNSHIP is an inactive township" is evidence of this answer.

answer: No, Elmwood Township is inactive and currently nobody lives there.

text: There is no evidence supporting that nobody lives in this town.

text: This answer is too specific and unaccounted for.

refinement: Possibly not, Elmwood Township is inactive.

text: "ELMWOOD TOWNSHIP is an inactive township" is evidence that the town is inactive.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Where did the township get its name from?

answer: It got its name from a community in Missouri.

text: "Elmwood Township was erected in 1870, taking its name from the community of Elmwood, Missouri." is evidence that the township was named after a community in Missouri.

answer: The township was named after the community of Elmwood, Missouri.

text: "Elmwood Township was erected in 1870, taking its name from the community of Elmwood, Missouri." is evidence that the township was named after a community in Missouri.

answer: The township was named after the community of Elmwood.

text: It should specify where the community of Elmwood is to help readers better understand where it was named after.

refinement: The township was named after the community of Elmwood, Missouri.

answer: The township got its name from the community of Elmwood, Missouri.

text: "Elmwood Township was erected in 1870, taking its name from the community of Elmwood, Missouri." is evidence that the township was named after a community in Missouri.

answer: It took its name from the community of Elmwood, Missouri.

text: "Elmwood Township was erected in 1870, taking its name from the community of Elmwood, Missouri." is evidence that the township was named after a community in Missouri.

question: Write a ~3 sentence summary.

answer: Elmwood Township is an inactive township located in Saline County, Missouri. The township was created in 1870 and named after the community of Elmwood. It is currently uninhabited.

text: There is no evidence supporting that the township is uninhabited.

refinement: Elmwood Township is an inactive township located in Saline County, Missouri. The township was created in 1870 and named after the community of Elmwood.

text: The location of its namesake should be specified.

refinement: Elmwood Township is an inactive township located in Saline County, Missouri. The township was created in 1870 and named after the community of Elmwood, Missouri.

text: This is not a three-sentence summary.

refinement: Elmwood Township is an inactive township located in Saline County, Missouri. The township was created in 1870. It was named after the community of Elmwood, Missouri.

answer: Elmwood Township is an inactive township in Saline County, Missouri, US. It was created in 1870. It was named after the community of Elmwood.

text: The summary should specify the location of the community it is named after to give readers a better understanding of its namesake.

refinement: Elmwood Township is an inactive township in Saline County, Missouri, US. It was created in 1870. It was named after the community of Elmwood in Missouri.

answer: Elmwood Township is a township. The township is located in Saline County, Missouri. Elmwood named their township after the community of Elmwood, Missouri.

answer: Elmwood Township is inactive in Saline County, Missouri. The township was formed in 1870; its name is derived from the community of Elmwood.

text: Should specify where the community of Elmwood is.

refinement: Elmwood Township is inactive in Saline County, Missouri. The township was formed in 1870; its name is derived from the community of Elmwood in Missouri.

answer: The Elmwood Township is named after the community of Elmwood. It is situated in Saline County, Missouri. The township was built in 1870 and is currently inactive.


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They still think they can fix me.

See, I'm the kind of guy that likes to live in the moment. We can't always be looking back, now can we? And instead of putting me in prison, I'm put in Arkham Asylum. They thought it would be too dangerous having me around to mastermind those criminals. Ho-ho-he-he-ha.

As if my jokes weren't getting any worse.

No, see, now I can have even better people to work with. And it's all gonna lead up to when me and Bats can meet up again. And it will happen, don't worry, don't worry.

They say I'm crazy. I'm not crazy, I'm not. I'm ahead of the curve. Schemers are crazy. Planners. People who think that they can bend the world to their own will. Tell me tell me, how often, do your, uh, plans, work out? Do you really think that, for a moment, that harpy, Mother Earth, is gonna care about your plans?

See, I realize that planning is useless. Chaos, now that's a different story. Things naturally go towards chaos. I mean, look around you. Everything is hell. All I did was give it a little push, to start rolling. The rest it did by itself.

And now they hate Bats. Now, now they throw him out. I warned you, Bats, I told you. But no, not the unstoppable force, you wouldn't give up. That's why I'm around, to give you purpose. Just like you give me. It's amazing, isn't it? I mean, that's something to smile about, right?

And Harvey. Harvey, Harvey, Harvey. I didn't have to tell you to do anything. The coin was a nice touch, I must say. Thanks to you, I've won. See, Bats may have everyone else fooled. But we know, we know the truth. You, me, Bats, even Gordon. We know how good the people of Gotham really are. Harvey, Harvey, Harvey.

And the doctors here, they still think they can fix me. I tell them, I say, there is nothing to fix. But they try and try. They are terrified of me. That's good, that's chaos. There is one doctor here who isn't, though. Harleen Quinzel. Interesting woman. She isn't a schemer. I know the schemers when I see them. That's why I've always loved Bats. He isn't a schemer. He doesn't plan, he acts. I like that.

But this doctor, this squeeze, is intrigued. I know, I can tell. I've had enough doctors poking at me over the years to know when they are just doing their job, and when they are actually listening to me. She's curious. That's good, that's very good.

I have a surprize for you, Bats. I know you can beat him, I know. But that's not the point. The point is that you will have to try. Oh, and just to make it interesting, I haven't told him anything about your being Brucie. Oh, you didn't think I knew about that? Hehe-ho! I did, I do! But I won't tell him anything. Makes it a little more interesting.
Quin-something, doctor lady, is coming again. She visits me more and more often. I must be ready for her, right? Right, right.

Why so serious?

*(edit: "I'm the kind of guy that likes to think ahead" to "I'm the kind of guy who lives in the moment")

title: Thoughts of an InSane Mind (Joker Monologue)

question: Why was the narrator put in Arkham Asylum?

answer: The narrator was put in Arkham Asylum because he is a criminal mastermind.

text: The justification given is that having him near other criminals is dangerous.

refinement: The narrator was put in Arkham Asylum because he is too dangerous to keep near other criminals.

text: 'They thought it would be too dangerous having me around to mastermind those criminals'

answer: It was believed that it would be too dangerous to keep him in a prison where he could mastermind criminals.

text: 'They thought it would be too dangerous having me around to mastermind those criminals'

answer: The narrator was put in Arkham Asylum because he is considered dangerous and unstable. He likes to live in the moment and does not plan ahead, preferring chaos instead. He believes that this makes him ahead of the curve, and that it is what makes him so dangerous. The narrator is also intrigued by Dr. Harleen Quinzel, and believes that she is someone who can understand him.

text: 'He likes to live in the moment and does not plan ahead, preferring chaos instead. He believes that this makes him ahead of the curve, and that it is what makes him so dangerous. The narrator is also intrigued by Dr. Harleen Quinzel, and believes that she is someone who can understand him.' is irrelevant to the question

refinement: The narrator was put in Arkham Asylum because he is considered dangerous and unstable.

text: 'They thought it would be too dangerous having me around to mastermind those criminals.'

answer: The narrator is a criminal mastermind.

text: The justification given is that having him near other criminals is dangerous.

refinement: The narrator was put in Arkham Asylum because he is too dangerous to keep near other criminals.

text: 'They thought it would be too dangerous having me around to mastermind those criminals.'

question: Describe the narrator?

answer: The narrator is someone who lives in the moment and enjoys chaos. He is unpredictable and enjoys toying with others, especially Batman. He is also intelligent and manipulative, and enjoys toying with the doctors at Arkham Asylum.

text: 'See, I'm the kind of guy that likes to live in the moment.'

text: 'Oh, and just to make it interesting, I haven't told him anything about your being Brucie. Oh, you didn't think I knew about that? Hehe-ho! I did, I do! But I won't tell him anything. Makes it a little more interesting.' is evidence that the narrator is intelligent and manipulative.

text: Answer is not relevant

answer: The narrator is in an asylum because they were deemed too dangerous for prison. He describes himself as someone who lives in the moment. He also doesn't believe he's crazy and that doctors can't fix him because there's nothing to fix.

text: 'And the doctors here, they still think they can fix me. I tell them, I say, there is nothing to fix.' is evidence about the doctors.

text: 'They thought it would be too dangerous having me around'

answer: The narrator is a man who is in Arkham Asylum. He is a schemer and a planner. He is also a jokester.

text: The narrator doesn't like schemers.

refinement: The narrator is a man who is in Arkham Asylum. He dislikes schemer and a planners. He is also a jokester.

text: 'I'm put in Arkham Asylum.'

text: 'As if my jokes weren't getting any worse.' is evidence he's a jokester.

question: Who is Harvey?

answer: That isn't made clear in the story, but the narrator says he helped him win at something.

text: The pronouns are ambiguous.

refinement: That isn't made clear in the story, but the narrator says Harvey helped him win at something.

text: 'Thanks to you, I've won.'

answer: Harvey is the man who orchestrated the coin toss that resulted in the Joker's victory over Batman.

text: The answer can't be found in the text.

answer: Harvey is a character in the story.

text: The answer is too vague, but not enough information is given in the text.

text: 'Harvey. I didn't have to tell you to do anything.' is evidence of a character named harvey

text: Not relevant

question: What is the surprise the narrator has for Bats?

answer: The narrator has a surprise for Bats, but he hasn't told him anything about the surprise.

text: The surprise is that the narrator knows Bats can beat another person.

refinement: The narrator has a surprise for Bats, but he hasn't told him anything about the surprise.

text: 'I have a surprize for you, Bats. I know you can beat him, I know.' is evidence of the surprise.

text: not relevant

answer: It seems that the narrator has someone who will fight Bats, but it's not clear.

text: 'I have a surprize for you, Bats. I know you can beat him, I know.'

answer: The narrator plans to keep information about Batman's identity from the Joker's fellow inmate, Harvey, in order to make the game more interesting.

text: There is no character named Batman in the story.

refinement: The narrator plans to keep information about Bats' identity from the Joker's fellow inmate, Harvey, in order to make the game more interesting.

text: There is no character named Joker in the story.

refinement: The narrator plans to keep information about Bats' identity from the narrator's fellow inmate, Harvey, in order to make the game more interesting.

text: There is no evidence Harvey is an inmate.

refinement: The narrator plans to keep information about Bats' identity from Harvey, in order to make the game more interesting.

text: 'I haven't told him anything about your being Brucie. Oh, you didn't think I knew about that? Hehe-ho! I did, I do! But I won't tell him anything. Makes it a little more interesting.' is evidence the narrator knows information

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: The narrator is in the Arkham Asylum because authorities thought it would be too dangerous to keep him in a prison where he could mastermind criminals. The narrator addresses Harvey and Bats in a monologue that details his opinions. He explains to Bats that he has a surprise for him, and says he knows he can beat the surprise. The narrator also mentions they have an interest in their doctor Harleen Quinzel, who he believes is intrigued by him.

text: 'And instead of putting me in prison, I'm put in Arkham Asylum.' is evidence they're in an asylum

text: 'They thought it would be too dangerous having me around to mastermind those criminals.'

text: 'I have a surprize for you, Bats. I know you can beat him, I know.'

text: 'There is one doctor here who isn't, though. Harleen Quinzel.'

answer: The Joker is a criminal mastermind who is currently incarcerated in Arkham Asylum. He is planning to escape and meet up with Batman again.

text: there's no evidence the narrator plans to escape

refinement: The Joker is a criminal mastermind who is currently incarcerated in Arkham Asylum.

text: Harleen Quinzel should be mentioned in the summary.

refinement: The Joker is a criminal mastermind who is currently incarcerated in Arkham Asylum. He is regularly visited by a doctor, Harleen Quinzel, who is fascinated by him.

text: There is no evidence the narrator is called 'Joker'.

refinement: The narrator is a criminal mastermind who is currently incarcerated in Arkham Asylum. He is regularly visited by a doctor, Harleen Quinzel, who is fascinated by him.

text: It should be mentioned he has an inner monologue in which he addresses other characters.

refinement: The narrator is a criminal mastermind who is currently incarcerated in Arkham Asylum. He has an inner monologue in which he addresses other characters, Bats and Harvey. He is regularly visited by a doctor, Harleen Quinzel, who is fascinated by him.

text: 'I'm put in Arkham Asylum. They thought it would be too dangerous having me around to mastermind those criminals.'

answer: The Joker is aware that he is seen as crazy, but he insists that he is not. He believes that planning is useless, and that chaos is more interesting. He is intrigued by Dr. Harleen Quinzel, and plans to use her curiosity to his advantage. He is confident that Batman will have to work hard to defeat the Joker's latest ally, and that the Joker knows about Batman's secret identity.

text: The names Batman and Joker are not used in the story.

refinement: The narrator is aware that he is seen as crazy, but he insists that he is not. He believes that planning is useless, and that chaos is more interesting. He is intrigued by Dr. Harleen Quinzel, and plans to use her curiosity to his advantage. He is confident that Bats will have to work hard to defeat the narrator's latest ally, and that the narrator knows about Bats' secret identity.

answer: The narrator is in Arkham Asylum because they are considered too dangerous to be around other criminals. They are not crazy, but they are ahead of the curve. They are not a schemer, but they like chaos. They have a surprise for Batman.

text: The name Batman is not used in the text.

refinement: The narrator is in Arkham Asylum because they are considered too dangerous to be around other criminals. They are not crazy, but they are ahead of the curve. They are not a schemer, but they like chaos. They have a surprise for Bats.

text: The third sentence should be removed in favor of discussing Harleen Quinzel.

refinement: The narrator is in Arkham Asylum because they are considered too dangerous to be around other criminals. They are not crazy, but they are ahead of the curve. They are visited by a curious doctor named Harleen Quinn. They have a surprise for Bats.


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A tragic student has died after being washed off cliffs in front of her horrified pals.

Pranita Mehta was holidaying with a group of friends in Gorkarna beach in India when a massive wave suddenly hit the group.

Pranita, 21, desperately tried to grip onto the rocks as the water hammered down on Sunday, but she was unable to keep her hold and was dragged out to sea.

Just moments after she was pulled out into the water, her desperate friends began screaming for help from police and staff at the hotel in which they were all staying.

After a search of around 40 minutes, her body was finally found and brought back to the shore by fishermen where the popular law student was pronounced dead.

[Pranita Mehta, who died after falling from Kaup lighthouse while trying to take the 'perfect selfie']

Law student Pranita Mehta was holidaying with a group of friends (Image: Facebook)
It was previously reported that Pranita fell 300ft from a lighthouse while taking a selfie.

READ MORE:Teen's final moments before she's killed by train while posing for selfie captured in shocking picture

This has since proved to be incorrect as heartbroken friends revealed the brave woman had battled in the waters for close to an hour before help arrived - too late to save her.

The group had set off to see a nearby lighthouse when the tragedy happened just after midday.

question: How and where did Pranita Mehta die?

answer: At Gorkarna beach in India, she was hit by a massive wave and dragged out to the ocean.

answer: Pranita Mehta died after being washed off the cliffs of a beach in India.

text: The name of the beach is omitted while it is clearly stated in the article. Also, the fact that they were hit by a wave, which caused the accident.

refinement: After being hit by a massive wave on Gorkarna beach in India, Pranita Mehta died tragically after being washed off the cliffs and dragged to the ocean.

answer: Pranita Mehta tragically died after being washed off the cliffs of Gorkarna Beach in India.

text: It was omitted that her group was first hit by a massive wave that caused the accident.

refinement: When her group got struck by the massive wave on Gorkana Beach in India, Pranita Mehta tragically died after being washed off the cliffs and dragged to the ocean.

question: What was Pranita doing when she fell?

answer:
A tragic student has died after being washed off cliffs in front of her horrified pals.
Pranita, 21, desperately tried to grip onto the rocks as the water hammered down on Sunday, but she was unable to keep her hold and was dragged out to sea.
Just moments after she was pulled out into the water, her desperate friends began screaming for help from police and staff at the hotel in which they were all staying.
Just moments after she was pulled out into the water, her desperate friends began screaming for help from police and staff at the hotel in which they were all staying. After a search of around 40 minutes, her body was finally found and brought back to the shore by fishermen where the popular law student was pronounced dead.
After a search of around 40 minutes, her body was finally found and brought back to the shore by fishermen where the popular law student was pronounced dead.

text: The response is a copy and paste of the input and does not directly and explicitly answer the question of what she was doing when the accident happened.

refinement: Pranita was on holiday with her friends at the Gorkana beach in India when they got hit by a massive wave. She tried desperately to save herself by hanging on to a rock, but as the water hammered down, she lost her grip and was dragged out to sea.

answer: She was on holiday with a group of friends.

text: The response omitted her action after she fell

refinement: Pranita was on holiday with her friends at the Gorkana beach in India when they got hit by a massive wave. She tried desperately to save herself by hanging on to a rock, but as the water hammered down, she lost her grip and was dragged out to sea.

text: No response to the question.

refinement: Pranita was on holiday with her friends at the Gorkana beach in India when they got hit by a massive wave. She tried desperately to save herself by hanging on to a rock, but as the water hammered down, she lost her grip and was dragged out to sea.

question: What "proved to be incorrect" in the article?

answer: It was previously reported that Pranita fell 300 ft from a lighthouse while taking a selfie.

answer: That Pranita Mehta fell from a lighthouse while trying to take a selfie, when in fact, she struggled in the sea after waves swept her away while exploring a nearby lighthouse.

answer: It was previously believed that Pranita Mehta fell from a lighthouse while posing for a selfie. However, friends have since revealed that she battled for over an hour in the water before the help arrived, meaning she ultimately died due to being washed off the nearby cliffs.

text: According to Pranita's friends, she battled in the water for close to an hour, but the response says she battled for over an hour in the water.

refinement: It was previously believed that Pranita Mehta fell from a lighthouse while posing for a selfie. However, friends have since revealed that she battled for close to an hour in the water before the help arrived but by the time help arrived, she had died. Ultimately, this means that she died due to being washed off the nearby cliffs.

question: Were there witnesses to her death?

answer: There are no details on whether or not there were witnesses to Pranita's death.

text: According to the article, Pranita battled for her life in the water before she was draged to sea and was later discovered by fishermen. if there were no witnesses to her death, how were her friends able to confirm her last moments?

refinement: Yes, her friends were present to witness the tragedy since they were the ones who called for help when she began drowning.

answer: Her friends witnessed her being pulled out into the water.

text: "Her desperate friends began screaming for help..." indicates that they witnessed her drowning.

answer: There were witnesses to Pranita's death as her friends were present when it occurred.

text: "Her desperate friends began screaming for help..." indicates that they witnessed her drowning.

question: Write a ~3 sentence summary.

answer: 21-year-old Pranita Mehta died on her vacation in India after a wave washed her out to sea and she was not able to hold on to the rocks. After hours of searching, she was finally found by fishermen and pronounced dead. The friends of Mehta blamed the police for not assisting in her rescue.

text:
They searched for her body for 40 minutes, but the response says they searched for hours, which is incorrect. The summary also says that Mehta's friends blamed the police for not assisting in her rescue, but there is no evidence in the article suggesting that the police didn't help in her rescue.
The summary also fails to mention the false report regarding her death.

refinement: 21-year-old Pranita Mehta died on her vacation in India after a wave washed her out to sea. After searching for her for 40 minutes, she was finally found by fishermen and pronounced dead. However, there were false rumors which stated that she died after falling 300ft from a lighthouse while taking a selfie, but her friends debunked those rumors and confirmed she battled for her life for almost an hour in the sea.

answer: Ms Pranita Mehta died after a massive wave hit the group of friends she was with during a holiday. Her death was initially misreported as a tragic accident due to her being swept off a lighthouse by a massive wave while trying to take a photo of herself. Sadly the reality was that she fought in the waters for an hour before help arrived - she and her friends had set out to see a nearby lighthouse.

text: The summary states that the false report said she was swept off a lighthouse by a massive wave, which is incorrect. However, the false report said she fell 300ft from the lighthouse while trying to take a selfie. The summary also omits the name of the beach and location.

refinement: Pranita Mehta died after a massive wave hit she and her friends during a holiday in Gorkarna Beach, India, when they had set out to see a nearby lighthouse. Her death was initially misreported as a tragic accident due to her falling off a lighthouse while taking a photo of herself. Sadly, the reality was that she fought in the waters for almost an hour before help arrived.

answer: Pranita Mehta, a 21 year-old, was on holiday with a group of friends at Gorkarna beach in India, when a massive wave suddenly hit the group. Pranita was swept out to sea. After 40 minutes of searching, she was finally found and pronounced dead.

text: The summary fails to mention who went searching for her, who found her body, and the fact that her friends called out for help.

refinement: Pranita Mehta, a 21-year-old, was on holiday with a group of friends at Gorkarna beach in India when a massive wave suddenly hit the group, and Pranita was swept out to sea. Desperate, her friends cried out for help from police and staff at the hotel they stayed in. After 40 minutes of searching, she was finally found by fishermen, but unfortunately, she was pronounced dead.

answer: Pranita Mehta dies on India's Gorkarana Beach. While trying to save herself from being dragged out into the water, her friends run to the police for help. They try to save her but she was pronounced dead eventually.

text: The summary doesn't mention who pronounced Pranita dead and who tried to save her.

refinement: Pranita Mehta dies on India's Gorkarana Beach. While trying to save herself from being dragged out into the water, her friends run to the police for help to try to save her. After a while, some fishermen find her body in the water, and she is pronounced dead eventually.

answer: A 21-year-old law student vacationing with friends sets off to see a nearby lighthouse along a dangerous coastline in Gorkarna beach, India with her friends. She found herself swept off a cliff by a rushing current, and her friends alerted water authorities as well as the police of her dire situation. She vanished into the ocean after a 40-minute search, and her body was finally found by two fishermen.

text: The summary mentions a dangerous coastline, but there isn't any evidence of such in the input. There is also no mention of Pranita's friends alerting water authorities to help their friend in her dire situation. The summary also fails to mention the name of the 21-year-old law student and that she was pronounced dead when the fishermen found her body.

refinement: Pranita Mehta, a 21-year-old law student, vacationing with friends, set off to see a nearby lighthouse in Gorkarna Beach, India, with her friends. A massive wave hit their group, and Pranita was swept off a cliff by a rushing current. Desperate, her friends alerted the police and staff at the hotel they stayed in of her dire situation. Unfortunately, Pranita vanished into the ocean, and after a 40-minute search, two fishermen eventually found her body, but she was pronounced dead.

answer: A college student from India, Pranita Mehta, was with her college friends when a massive wave hit the group. She tried to hold onto the rocks, but couldn't keep her grasp, and she was dragged out to sea. She was later found, but declared dead at the scene.

text: The summary says Pranita was a college student, but there is no evidence of that in the article. The article also doesn't state that her friends were in college as well. It also doesn't mention how she was found and who found her. The article doesn't state where she's from either.

refinement: Pranita Mehta, a law student, was on holiday with her friends in Gorkana Beach, in India, when a massive wave hit them while they were on their way to see a nearby lighthouse. Pranita tried to hold onto the rocks but couldn't keep her grasp, and the heavy water currents dragged her out to sea. She was later found by fishermen but was declared dead at the scene.


text:
It was the middle of the night when I heard continuous tapping. Slightly, I opened my eyes to see a light in the hallway and noticed that there was a lack of warmth by the side of my bed. My wife, Annie must’ve have been tapping, so I went downstairs to figure the situation out. My eyes were still adjusting to the dim light, but I quickly noticed a grisly shadow. It was an unfamiliar figure, it was a bitter looking intruder, and next to him was my wife, cold on the floor. Then the intruder’s black eyes coldly shot mine, and with his rough hands, he shot me.

A gleam of light shines in my eyes and I quickly rise up. I panic, it seems as though I’ve been in deep slumber for a long time. As I rise up, I pulled on something which went into my skin; it was an IV needle which I detached. Unclear to this situation, I look at my surroundings. My IV bag is completely empty, the Hospital is filled with complete silence and the room is faint. My situation doesn’t seem to make sense, as it seems nothing is operating and no one is working. Quickly, the stood up on my feet but felt as though I would fall a second later, but with enough effort I reached the bathroom. In the view of the dark room, I can see myself through the filthy mirror. It reflected an image of a ghostly pale man with a beard. I could not conclude anything just yet, and needed more information about my situation. I barely manage to jog through the hospital’s mysterious hallway with the only sound being my footsteps and my breath. Why was no one here to care for me? Why was I alone? I quickly grew frustrated as my questions only developed.

I opened the door at the exit and felt an eerie gust of wind blow at my face. The polluted smell of dead bodies came rushing through my nose, yet I saw no dead bodies. In fact I didn’t see a body in sight, dead or alive. Everything was put at a complete stop. Traffic of cars was abandoned in the middle of streets and a row of stores went unmanaged. Yet I was more abandoned than any car or store as I was completely alone without another human. The cars were kept together by road and stores merged by shared walls. Suddenly, I felt a harsh pressure hit my chest and fell to the ground without much effort.

I opened my eyes to look at the empty world. Then, I saw someone. Someone was alive in this desolated place, and she was coming towards me. Once we met, she told me her name was Anne; she looked familiar but seemed to be in dangerous condition. The massive amount of lipstick on her mouth contrasted with paleness. After an aggressive set of dry coughs, I managed to agree to travel with her.

Rough Draft is Rough. Can anyone help give me some pointers or critiques?

title: Alone, Awake, Helpless

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Where was the narrator's wife when they got shot?

answer: At his feet.

text: This answer is incorrect. The wife isn't at the narrator's feet, she's next to the shooter. "...it was a bitter looking intruder, and next to him was my wife, cold on the floor."

refinement: She is next to the shooter on the floor.

answer: Next to the intruder

text: The wife is also on the floor. "... it was a bitter looking intruder, and next to him was my wife, cold on the floor."

answer: The narrator's wife was on the floor, cold. The intruder had shot the narrator, and the wife was beside the intruder.

text: The narrator hadn't been shot yet when he notices his wife beside the intruder. It would be better to omit that.

refinement: The narrator's wife was on the floor, cold. The wife was beside the intruder.

answer: The narrator's wife was on the floor, cold, in the intruder's presence.

text: Specify that the wife was next to the intruder. "...it was a bitter looking intruder, and next to him was my wife, cold on the floor."

refinement: The narrator's wife was on the floor, cold, next to the intruder.

answer: Next to the intruder.

text: The wife was also on the floor. "...it was a bitter looking intruder, and next to him was my wife, cold on the floor."

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why does the narrator feel he has been in a deep sleep for a while?

answer: The narrator feels as though he has been in a deep sleep for a while because he wakes up in a hospital with no one around him. The lack of any other living people in this environment leads him to assume he has been asleep for a long period of time.

text: This answer isn't an actual explanation for why the narrator believes they were in a long slumber. Really, there is no answer provided, but it can be assumed he felt he had been in a deep sleep due to being shot.

refinement: There is no answer provided, but it can be assumed he felt he had been in a deep sleep due to being shot.

answer: The narrator feels as though he has been in a deep sleep for a while because when he awoke, the hospital where he was staying was empty and abandoned. No one was there to take care of him and the outside world was covered in death and decay. In addition, he managed to dislodge an IV needle into his skin and saw Anne in a state of extreme illness. The narrator has been left alone, awake, and helpless due to what he believes to be a catastrophic event.

text: This doesn't answer the question and provides lots of irrelevant details. Really, there is no answer provided, but it can be assumed he felt he had been in a deep sleep due to being shot.

refinement: There is no answer provided, but it can be assumed he felt he had been in a deep sleep due to being shot.

answer: Not answered.

text: The text doesn't say specifically, but it could be presumed it's because he was shot.

refinement: Not answered, but it could be presumed it's because he was shot.

answer: The text does not say.

text: The text doesn't say specifically, but it could be presumed it's because he was shot.

refinement: The text does not say, but it could be presumed it's because he was shot.

answer: Information can't be found.

text: The text doesn't say specifically, but it could be presumed it's because he was shot.

refinement: Information can't be found, but it could be presumed it's because he was shot.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who does the narrator meet at the end?

answer: His wife.

text: "... she told me her name was Anne; she looked familiar..."

answer: The narrator meets Anne at the end.

text: "... she told me her name was Anne; she looked familiar..."

answer: Anne.

text: "... she told me her name was Anne; she looked familiar..."

answer: The narrator meets Anne.

text: "... she told me her name was Anne; she looked familiar..."

answer: Annie

text: "... she told me her name was Anne; she looked familiar..."

question: Write a ~6 sentence summary.

answer: It is a normal night when the narrator hears tapping on his window. His wife, Annie, taps on it to get his attention. Annie is on the floor with an intruder. The narrator dies from being shot. He wakes up feeling lost after dreaming he died, and his IV is out and he's free. The narrator walks by himself through a deserted hospital, eventually reaching his wife, Anne, who seems to be dying of pneumonia, and the two start walking together.

text: There is no mention of a normal night in the article or tapping on the window. Rewrite this to say the narrator goes to investigate after hearing a noise in his home and assuming it's his wife, Annie.

refinement: The narrator goes to investigate after hearing a noise in his home and assuming it's his wife, Annie. Annie is on the floor with an intruder. The narrator dies from being shot. He wakes up feeling lost after dreaming he died, and his IV is out and he's free. The narrator walks by himself through a deserted hospital, eventually reaching his wife, Anne, who seems to be dying of pneumonia, and the two start walking together.

text: Explain that Annie is on the floor cold, presumably dead.

refinement: The narrator goes to investigate after hearing a noise in his home and assuming it's his wife, Annie. Annie is on the floor, presumably dead, with an intruder. The narrator dies from being shot. He wakes up feeling lost after dreaming he died, and his IV is out and he's free. The narrator walks by himself through a deserted hospital, eventually reaching his wife, Anne, who seems to be dying of pneumonia, and the two start walking together.

text: Add that it's implied the narrator dies. Rewrite the sentence to say he was shot by the intruder.

refinement: The narrator goes to investigate after hearing a noise in his home and assuming it's his wife, Annie. Annie is on the floor, presumably dead, with an intruder. It's implied the narrator dies after being shot by the intruder.He wakes up feeling lost after dreaming he died, and his IV is out and he's free. The narrator walks by himself through a deserted hospital, eventually reaching his wife, Anne, who seems to be dying of pneumonia, and the two start walking together.

text: The narrator didn't dream he died. He just woke up after a long slumber. He isn't free, either. Replace this by saying the hospital is deserted.

refinement: The narrator goes to investigate after hearing a noise in his home and assuming it's his wife, Annie. Annie is on the floor, presumably dead, with an intruder. It's implied the narrator dies after being shot by the intruder. He wakes up in a hospital feeling like he slept for a long time, and sees that its deserted. The narrator walks by himself through a deserted hospital, eventually reaching his wife, Anne, who seems to be dying of pneumonia, and the two start walking together.

text: The narrator isn't aware Anne is his wife, so that should be mentioned when he reaches Anne. Also, she isn't dying of pneumonia, she's in a bad condition.

refinement: The narrator goes to investigate after hearing a noise in his home and assuming it's his wife, Annie. Annie is on the floor, presumably dead, with an intruder. It's implied the narrator dies after being shot by the intruder. He wakes up in a hospital feeling like he slept for a long time, and sees that its deserted. The narrator walks by himself through a deserted hospital, eventually meets a woman named Anne, unaware it's his wife, who is in bad condition, and the two start walking together.

text: Say that the two travel together instead of walking together. Make this a separate sentence.

refinement: The narrator goes to investigate after hearing a noise in his home and assuming it's his wife, Annie. Annie is on the floor, presumably dead, with an intruder. It's implied the narrator dies after being shot by the intruder. He wakes up in a hospital feeling like he slept for a long time, and sees that its deserted. The narrator walks by himself through a deserted hospital, eventually meets a woman named Anne, unaware it's his wife, who is in bad condition. The two decide to travel together.

answer: The narrator wakes to a noise in the middle of the night. They see their wife standing next to an intruder who abruptly shoots the narrator. They wake in a hospital, feeling like they've slumbered hard and for a long time. No one is in the hospital. Dazed, they wander outside, where they run into a woman who seems vaguely familiar. She says her name is Annie, and they agree to travel together.

text: "...their wife standing next to an intruder..." is false. It's stated the wife is laying on the floor, cold. This means she's probably dead.

refinement: The narrator wakes to a noise in the middle of the night. They see their wife laying on the floor, presumably dead, next to an intruder who abruptly shoots the narrator. They wake in a hospital, feeling like they've slumbered hard and for a long time. No one is in the hospital. Dazed, they wander outside, where they run into a woman who seems vaguely familiar. She says her name is Annie, and they agree to travel together.

text: To make it clear that the woman the narrator meets in the end is his wife, mention her name early in the summary.

refinement: The narrator wakes to a noise in the middle of the night. They assume it's their wife Annie. However, they see their wife laying on the floor, presumably dead, next to an intruder who abruptly shoots the narrator. They wake in a hospital, feeling like they've slumbered hard and for a long time. No one is in the hospital. Dazed, they wander outside, where they run into a woman who seems vaguely familiar. She says her name is Annie, and they agree to travel together.

answer:
In the middle of the night, an unfamiliar figure and Anne, half-dead, are on the kitchen floor. The narrator struggles to his feet and exits the hospital.

The outside world shows adult-sized toys, car engines and store merchandise left abandoned. The narrator sees and made moans to find her lost wife.
Finished, the narrator sees Anne about and they agree to head off together.

text: Start the story by saying  the narrator goes to investigate a noise in the kitchen, and expects it to be his wife, Annie.

refinement:
The narrator goes to investigate a noise in his kitchen, and expects it to be his wife, Annie. An unfamiliar figure and Annie, half-dead, are on the kitchen floor. The narrator struggles to his feet and exits the hospital.

The outside world shows adult-sized toys, car engines and store merchandise left abandoned. The narrator sees and made moans to find her lost wife.
Finished, the narrator sees Anne about and they agree to head off together.

text: It's omitted that the narrator is shot by the intruder and wakes in a hospital after what seems like a long sleep.

refinement:
The narrator goes to investigate a noise in his kitchen, and expects it to be his wife, Annie. An unfamiliar figure and Annie, half-dead, are on the kitchen floor. The narrator is then shot by the intruder.  The narrator wakes in a hospital after what seemed to be a long sleep. H struggles to his feet and exits the hospital.

The outside world shows adult-sized toys, car engines and store merchandise left abandoned. The narrator sees and made moans to find her lost wife.
Finished, the narrator sees Anne about and they agree to head off together.

text: It's omitted the hospital is deserted, and he explores it.

refinement:
The narrator goes to investigate a noise in his kitchen, and expects it to be his wife, Annie. An unfamiliar figure and Annie, half-dead, are on the kitchen floor. The narrator is then shot by the intruder.  The narrator wakes in a hospital after what seemed to be a long sleep. The struggles to his feet , and explores a the deserted hospital before exiting.

The outside world shows adult-sized toys, car engines and store merchandise left abandoned. The narrator sees and made moans to find her lost wife.
Finished, the narrator sees Anne about and they agree to head off together.

text: There is no mention of adult size toys or engines.

refinement:
The narrator goes to investigate a noise in his kitchen, and expects it to be his wife, Annie. An unfamiliar figure and Annie, half-dead, are on the kitchen floor. The narrator is then shot by the intruder.  The narrator wakes in a hospital after what seemed to be a long sleep. The struggles to his feet , and explores the deserted hospital before exiting.

The outside world shows streets, cars, and store merchandise left abandoned. The narrator sees and made moans to find her lost wife.
Finished, the narrator sees Anne about and they agree to head off together.

text: The narrator does not moan or look for his wife. Replace this by saying he runs into a woman named Anne, but is unaware that it's his wife.

refinement:
The narrator goes to investigate a noise in his kitchen, and expects it to be his wife, Annie. An unfamiliar figure and Annie, half-dead, are on the kitchen floor. The narrator is then shot by the intruder.  The narrator wakes in a hospital after what seemed to be a long sleep. The struggles to his feet , and explores the deserted hospital before exiting.

The outside world shows streets, cars, and store merchandise left abandoned. The narrator runs into a woman named Anne, unaware it's his wife, and they agree to head off together.

answer: The narrator wakes up alone and confused in a hospital after being shot during the night. There are no living beings around, and all the cars and stores in the city have been abandoned. Suddenly, a woman named Anne finds him and tells him her name. Although Anne is in poor condition, the narrator agrees to travel with her in this desolate world.

text: This summary totally ignores the beginning involving the intruder.

refinement: In the middle of the night, the narrator hears a noise in his home, and decides to investigate despite assuming it's his wife, Annie. Annie is presumably dead on the floor next to an intruder, who then shoots the narrator. The narrator wakes up alone and confused in a hospital after being shot during the night. There are no living beings around, and all the cars and stores in the city have been abandoned. Suddenly, a woman named Anne finds him and tells him her name. Although Anne is in poor condition, the narrator agrees to travel with her in this desolate world.

answer: In the middle of the night, an intruder invades the protagonist's home and assaults his wife. When the protagonist wakes up to investigate, the hospital he is in is abandoned and there is no one around apart from one other person, the woman named Anne. The protagonist feels isolated and confused, especially after Anne collapses due to sickness. The protagonist resolves to go on a journey with Anne and figure out what has happened.

text: It's omitted that the intruder probably killed the wife, Annie.

refinement: In the middle of the night, an intruder invades the protagonist's home and presumably kills the protagonist's wife, Annie.  When the protagonist wakes up to investigate, the hospital he is in is abandoned and there is no one around apart from one other person, the woman named Anne. The protagonist feels isolated and confused, especially after Anne collapses due to sickness. The protagonist resolves to go on a journey with Anne and figure out what has happened.

text: "When the protagonist wakes up to investigate" happens before the hospital. This sentence should be restructured to include the investigation and the protagonist being shot.

refinement: In the middle of the night, an intruder invades the protagonist's home and presumably kills the protagonist's wife, Annie.  When the protagonist goes to investigate, he sees Annie and is shot by the intruder. He wakes in a hospital that he realizes is abandoned and there is no one around apart from one other person, the woman named Anne. The protagonist feels isolated and confused, especially after Anne collapses due to sickness. The protagonist resolves to go on a journey with Anne and figure out what has happened.

text: Anne is not inside the hospital. He sees her outside. Include that he is unaware that she's his wife and she's in bad condition.

refinement: In the middle of the night, an intruder invades the protagonist's home and presumably kills the protagonist's wife, Annie.  When the protagonist goes to investigate, he sees Annie and is shot by the intruder. He wakes in a hospital that he realizes is abandoned. He leaves the hospital and sees the outside is desolate, except for a woman he sees, named Anne. He's unaware that she's his wife. The protagonist feels isolated and confused, especially after Anne collapses due to sickness. The protagonist resolves to go on a journey with Anne and figure out what has happened.

text: "The protagonist feels isolated..." is a totally false sentence and should be removed.

refinement: In the middle of the night, an intruder invades the protagonist's home and presumably kills the protagonist's wife, Annie.  When the protagonist goes to investigate, he sees Annie and is shot by the intruder. He wakes in a hospital that he realizes is abandoned. He leaves the hospital and sees the outside is desolate, except for a woman he sees, named Anne. He's unaware that she's his wife. The protagonist resolves to go on a journey with Anne and figure out what has happened.

text: The protagonist and his wife don't establish they're trying to figure out what happened. They just agree to travel together.

refinement: In the middle of the night, an intruder invades the protagonist's home and presumably kills the protagonist's wife, Annie.  When the protagonist goes to investigate, he sees Annie and is shot by the intruder. He wakes in a hospital that he realizes is abandoned. He leaves the hospital and sees the outside is desolate, except for a woman he sees, named Anne. He's unaware that she's his wife. The two decide to travel together.