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Justice (C) 2012-2013 Victor D. Lopez
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Time: The all too near future
Place: A courtroom
Setting: Final sentencing for the last remaining capital offense on the books of an apparently kinder, gentler more just world where equality is no longer a mere aspiration.
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Justice

The prisoner stared impassively into the camera. The bright lights causing beads of sweat to form above his eyes and forcing him to squint, his perspiration-soaked thinning hair flattened unflatteringly against his forehead. No sound could be heard other than the faint hum of the air conditioning whose airflow was directed from the high ceiling above the high seats of the three judge panel, towards the three judged, keeping their immediate area comfortably cool. The camera trained on them remained a respectful distance away, and no harsh lights illuminated their somber countenances.

All three judges stared at the camera showing no emotion, their hands folded in front of them on the surface of their capacious bench on top of three equal, neat stacks of paper piled before each judge. Everywhere on earth citizens watched the unfolding drama over the neural net that provided a fully immersive experience indistinguishable from reality, effectively placing every citizen of earth in the courtroom as the Chief Judge began to speak in a deep, resonant, clear voice.

“The evidence against you has been examined. This tribunal finds you guilty of the charges against you by a unanimous vote. Have you anything you would like to add before we pass sentence?”

The camera changed back to the prisoner. The lights brightens around him and the heat rises perceptibly, adding fresh fuel to the trickle of sweat flowing down his flushed face, causing a bead of sweat to form at the end of his nose that he cannot swat away because his wrists are restrained by metal bands at the armrests of his chair, outside the viewing range of the camera which has a tight zoom on his face. “I am guilty of no crime,” the prisoner spoke in a low voice full of palpable weariness and resignation.

“You are guilty of the most heinous of crimes,” the Chief Judge contradicted. "That is not open to debate. This is your final chance to make what amends you may to those whom you have harmed through your selfish, deviant act. It will have no effect on the sentencing by this Court.”

“But I have done nothing wrong,” the man emphatically repeated, the perspiration rolling down his neck deepening the growing ring of sweat absorbed by his bright orange jumper, staining a dark collar of moisture around his neck.

“Silence!” the Chief Judge hissed. “The record will show that the prisoner is unrepentant. This Court finds that the prisoner willfully, maliciously and without justification removed his neural connector with the purpose and effect of disconnecting himself from the Net. We further find that the motivating factor for this egregious, willful and repugnant crime was the attempt to abandon the Common Consciousness and establish his individuality separate and apart from the Communal Mind. We further find that the subject is in full possession of his legal faculties and capable of understanding the criminal nature of his acts, and, perhaps most tragically, that he fails to see the enormity of his crime.” The Chief Justice faltered slightly, delivering the final words of the Courts sentence with a slight tremor in his voice. After stopping a moment to compose himself as his learned colleagues looked on impassively, he continued. “It is, therefore, the judgment of this Court that you will forever remain disconnected from the nets from this day forward.”

Upon hearing the Judge’s words the prisoner’s eyes opened wider, attempting to digest their import. Could it be? Could he finally be allowed the freedom to regain his humanity? The unalienable right to be an individual for the first time in his life? The opportunity to live in a world in which he could have original thoughts, genuine emotions, and the opportunity to be different from everyone else? The joy in these words nearly made him faint with relief and unbridled joy, allowing him for the first time in his life the possibility of hope as tears welled in his eyes. He found he could not speak, could not express even the simple words “thank you” to the Court. It was as though he were emerging from a life-long nightmare, as if . . .

“The prisoner’s IP address, 999.999.999.999, shall be erased from the Nets,” the Judge continued as the prisoner’s tears flowed freely. His existence shall be forever stricken from the Collective Consciousness lest it germinate there and once again grow sedition in our midst.” The prisoner wept openly now while smiling broadly. “The death sentence for this most heinous of crimes is hereby commuted so that the prisoner may be allowed the individuality he craved for the rest of his natural life, devoid of the comfort of humanity or the distracting influences of life.”

The Chief Judge then paused and took a deep breath. “It is further ordered by this Court that the prisoner shall have his eyes, eardrums, tongue and olfactory organs surgically removed that he may not see, hear, taste, or speak with any other human being for the rest of his natural life. thereafter, he is to be remanded to a hospital where he shall be restrained to a bed and tended to by robotic life support aids. The sentence of this Court shall be carried out immediately and shall be witnessed by all Citizens of Earth as partial reparation for this most heinous of crimes against humanity.”

The prisoner’s screams lasted only a few moments as an anesthetic was administered and the cameras were re-arranged in preparation for justice to be carried out.

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Justice - from Book of Dreams 2e: Science Fiction and Speculative Fiction Short Stories (c) 2013 by Victor D. Lopez.

title: Justice

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the prisoner's punishment?

answer: The prisoner is guilty of removing his neural connector with the purpose and effect of disconnecting himself from the Net. The convict is also in full possession of his legal faculties but fails to see the enormity of his crime. As a result, he has to be removed from natural life and separated from humanity. The Chief Judge orders the prisoner's eyes, eardrums, tongue, and olfactory organs to be surgically removed and the convict will be sentenced to bed rest in hospital. The Chief Justice also orders the prisoner to be disconnected from the Common Consciousness.

answer: The prisoner is in front of a tribunal. The verdict is scream and permanently disconnected from the internet. The prisoner is recored to have removed the neural connector without the common consciousness and have gone against the idea of the collective consciousness. As such, the prisoner is sentenced to have his eyes, olfactory and other organs removed. He will be placed in detention, where he will be allowed to live.

answer: The prisoner screams that he has nothing to say. A successful surgical operation then removes the prisoner's eyesight, hearing, taste, and smell. Without the ability to see, hear, taste, or smell, the prisoner will exist in a world of silence for the remainder of his life.

text: The prisoner says that he is guilty of any crime.

refinement: The prisoner says that he is guilty of any crime. A successful surgical operation then removes the prisoner's eyesight, hearing, taste, and smell. Without the ability to see, hear, taste, or smell, the prisoner will exist in a world of silence for the remainder of his life.

text: The Chief Judge orders the prisoner's eyes, eardrums, tongue, and olfactory organs to be surgically removed and the convict will be sentenced to bed rest in the hospital.

refinement: The prisoner says that he is guilty of any crime. The Chief Judge orders the prisoner's eyes, eardrums, tongue, and olfactory organs to be surgically removed and the convict will be sentenced to bed rest in the hospital. Without the ability to see, hear, taste, or smell, the prisoner will exist in a world of silence for the remainder of his life.

text: It is omitted that the prisoner is guilty of removing his neural connector with the purpose and effect of disconnecting himself from the Net.

refinement: The prisoner is guilty of removing his neural connector with the purpose and effect of disconnecting himself from the Net. They say that they are not guilty of any crime. The Chief Judge orders the prisoner's eyes, eardrums, tongue, and olfactory organs to be surgically removed and the convict will be sentenced to bed rest in the hospital. Without the ability to see, hear, taste, or smell, the prisoner will exist in a world of silence for the remainder of his life.

answer: The prisoner is sentenced to forever remain disconnected from the nets from that day forward. The Court also sentences the prisoner to having his eyes, eardrums, tongue, and olfactory organs surgically removed.

answer: The prisoner is in front of a tribunal. The verdict is scream. The prisoner is recored to have removed the neural connector without the common consciousness and have gone against the idea of the collective consciousness. As such, the prisoner is sentenced to have his eyes, olfactory and other organs removed. He will be placed in detention, where he will be allowed to live.

answer: The prisoner is guilty of removing his neural connector with the purpose and effect of disconnecting himself from the Net. The convict is also in full possession of his legal faculties but fails to see the enormity of his crime. As a result, he has to be removed from natural life and separated from humanity. The Chief Judge orders the prisoner's eyes, eardrums, tongue, and olfactory organs to be surgically removed and the convict will be sentenced to bed rest in hospital. He will also be disconnected from the Common Consciousness.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about humanity in the future?

answer:
Justice (C) 2012-2013 Victor D. Lopez

Time: The all too near future

Time: The all too near future

In the Story: People on earth can now be "in" a courtroom as virtual beings.

text: The whole answer is irrelevant.

text: It is omitted in the future, people will have neural connectors that they will not be allowed to remove. They will be connected to the Common Consciousness and will have no individuality separate and apart from the Communal Mind.

refinement: In the future, people will have neural connectors that they will not be allowed to remove. They will be connected to the Common Consciousness and will have no individuality separate and apart from the Communal Mind.

answer: In the near future, humanity has sobered considerably. Crime is rare and undesirable behaviors are no longer tolerated. All kinds of crimes are punishable by disconnection.

text: 'in the near future, humanity has sobered considerably. Crime is rare and undesirable behaviors are no longer tolerated. All kinds of crimes are punishable by disconnecti' is not stated.

text: It is omitted that in the future, people will have neural connectors that they will not be allowed to remove. They will be connected to the Common Consciousness and will have no individuality separate and apart from the Communal Mind.

refinement: In the future, people will have neural connectors that they will not be allowed to remove. They will be connected to the Common Consciousness and will have no individuality separate and apart from the Communal Mind.

answer: People on earth can now be "in" a courtroom as virtual beings. Additionally, the keystone to the plot of the story is that capital punishment was seen as inhumane, and only one crime was left on the books as a crime to be punishable by death; removing one's neural connector so they could not regulate signals within the universal community.

text: 'Additionally, the keystone to the plot of the story is that capital punishment was seen as inhumane, and only one crime was left on the books as a crime to be punishable by death; removing one's neural connector so they could not regulate signals within the universal community' is irrelevant.

refinement: People on earth can now be "in" a courtroom as virtual beings. In the future, people will have neural connectors that they will not be allowed to remove. They will be connected to the Common Consciousness and will have no individuality separate and apart from the Communal Mind.

answer: The story takes place in the future. Technology has progressed to the point that the justices are sentenced over a neural net, "citizens watch the drama unfold". The Justice system is run by three judges. The judges pass a death sentence for the most heinous of crimes, but the sentencing is changed to allow the prisoner to be disconnected from the nets and have his senses removed from his body. They hope this would allow the convict the individuality he had craved for the rest of his natural life.

text: 'The Justice system is run by three judges. The judges pass a death sentence for the most heinous of crimes, but the sentencing is changed to allow the prisoner to be disconnected from the nets and have his senses removed from his body. They hope this would allow the convict the individuality he had craved for the rest of his natural life' is irellevant.

refinement: The story takes place in the future. Technology has progressed to the point that the justices are sentenced over a neural net, "citizens watch the drama unfold".

text: It is omitted that in the future, people will have neural connectors that they will not be allowed to remove. They will be connected to the Common Consciousness and will have no individuality separate and apart from the Communal Mind.

refinement: The story takes place in the future. Technology has progressed to the point that the justices are sentenced over a neural net, "citizens watch the drama unfold". In the future, people will have neural connectors that they will not be allowed to remove. They will be connected to the Common Consciousness and will have no individuality separate and apart from the Communal Mind.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the prisoner's family?

answer: No answer

answer: No answer

answer: The text doesn't say anything about the prisoner's family.

answer: The prisoner's family receives no mention in the story.

answer: The text doesn't say anything about the prisoner's family.

answer: No answer


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Reducing the money wasted on unprofitable media will be at the heart of L’Oréal’s advertising plans in 2018.

There is still “a lot of waste” in the media the advertiser buys, admitted Stéphane Bérubé, L’Oréal’s CMO for Western Europe. But unlike Procter & Gamble, Unilever and other big advertisers, L’Oréal has no intention of slashing its spend online to weed out ineffective ads. Instead, the cosmetics giant will spend more online next year, as it has over the last 12 months. It’s where the company’s ads appear that will impact ad waste, not how much it spends, explained Bérubé, who is warming to the idea that greater relevance comes at a premium. “I prefer to pay more sometimes to get the quality audiences rather than a cheap CPM,” he said.

To avoid cheap impressions, L’Oréal’s budgets are moving from open exchanges into private marketplaces, Bérubé said. In some markets, the advertiser is going directly to publishers to curate its own private marketplaces, a shift reliant on first-party data from areas such as L’Oréal’s limited e-commerce sales alongside data from publishers. Consequently, third-party data is becoming less important to the company’s campaigns, Bérubé said.

L’Oréal’s pullback from CPMs dates back to 2014, when it decided to buy display ads that are 70 percent in view on publisher sites. It would be too costly and restrictive on reach if those ads were 100 percent in view, the advertiser previously said. For video ads, the advertiser has been buying those that run through to completion, rather than paying for all impressions.

Buying viewable impressions was the main way the advertiser tried to curb wastage three years ago, whereas now it’s part of a wider shift to more addressable media buys, said Bérubé. In other words, L’Oréal is catching on to the value of people-based advertising, turning its first-party data into more effective campaigns. “We’re reviewing all our audience profiles,” Bérubé said. “We need to collect as much data as possible to be relevant to consumers.”

Understanding that wealth of data is easier said than done. In addition to examining return on investment and attribution modeling, L’Oréal’s marketers are also trying to understand some of the more opaque costs of its advertising such as cost per acquisition, consumer lifetime value and the value of cookies. L’Oréal is also hiring data experts to help make sense of the company’s customer data and question existing media practices. In some cases, data privacy experts are vetting technology and service providers. L’Oréal must bring more experts — not just in data — in-house, said Bérubé, not to replace agencies but to challenge them to be less “complacent” and to nurture their own specializations.

The topic of in-house talent versus agency expertise sparked frank comments from Bérubé at the Ad:tech London conference last month. L’Oréal isn’t trying to “kill the agency” by shaping its own media strategy, Bérubé assured delegates at the event. As dedicated to nurturing its own media expertise as L’Oréal is, Bérubé concedes it will never be able to plan and buy media at the scale an agency could. “Even if I have my have own [trading] desk internally, we’re never going to buy 100 million impressions,” he said. “The reason we’re doing this [in-housing talent] is to understand [our media investments]. If I have no clue about media, then how can I challenge my agency to do a good job?”

Bérubé believes another potential benefit of L’Oréal’s agencies leading media strategy is better remuneration. He said the advertiser plans to overhaul the way it remunerates agencies in many markets, moving away from models that view media as a commodity. “We need to go from treating it [media] as a commodity to be much more of a quality buy because agencies were just being incentivized to buy cheap media, whether that was on TV or online,” Bérubé said.

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Source: MediaRadar
L’Oréal’s crackdown on wastage helps explain its focus on the so-called long tail of advertising. In the last quarter, the advertiser not only increased its online spend in the U.S. versus the same period a year ago (as the chart above shows), but also the number of publisher sites its ads appeared on. According to a study by ad-tracking firm MediaRadar, L’Oréal, like P&G over a similar period, has become more confident in a supply chain that has forced some advertisers to reluctantly reduce their spend. The data doesn’t reveal how many of those ads are on cheap sites versus premium ones, however, meaning L’Oréal could still be prioritizing reach over content and context.

Bérubé claimed otherwise: “We have better visibility now on who is and who isn’t a real person [online]. I can tell you that we’re comfortable continuing to invest [in digital].”

_Image courtesy of L’Oréal._

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question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize everything relating to waste.

answer: It is stated that there is still a lot of wasted money on media due to unprofitable ads. The company will be spending more on online ads in 2018 and creating a pullback from CPMs, which is creating cheaper impressions. They have moved to private markets, which is reliant on first-party data from areas like L'Oreal's e-commerce sales, alongside publishers data. This means that third-party data is becoming less important. Poor ads were also bought 100% in-vision rather than 70%.

text:
- There is no evidence to show that poor ads were bought at 100% rather than 70%.
- The word "is" in the third sentence should be changed to plural.

refinement: It is stated that there is still a lot of wasted money on media due to unprofitable ads. The company will be spending more on online ads in 2018 and creating a pullback from CPMs, which is creating cheaper impressions. They have moved to private markets, which are reliant on first-party data from areas like L'Oreal's e-commerce sales, alongside publishers' data. This means that third-party data is becoming less important.

answer: L'Oréal is aiming to cut down on wasted media as part of its 2018 advertising plans. The company identifies wasted media as impressions that are neither viewed nor effective in generating conversions (or sales). L'Oréal is seeking to do this by moving away from open exchanges and into more targeted private marketplaces and by employing more data expertise internally. Conversely, L'Oréal is not trying to replace agencies by developing more internal media expertise, but rather wants to use data to better challenge agencies and incentivize them towards higher quality media buys. In addition, there's been a lift in requests for holiday influencer campaigns ahead of this upcoming season.

text: The last sentence does not represent L'Oreal's strategy as laid out in the article.

refinement: L'Oréal is aiming to cut down on wasted media as part of its 2018 advertising plans. The company identifies wasted media as impressions that are neither viewed nor effective in generating conversions (or sales). L'Oréal is seeking to do this by moving away from open exchanges and into more targeted private marketplaces and by employing more data expertise internally. Conversely, L'Oréal is not trying to replace agencies by developing more internal media expertise, but rather wants to use data to better challenge agencies and incentivize them towards higher quality media buys.

answer: L'Oréal's focus is on reducing the wasteful spending on media, seeing less return on investment in cheaper impressions. This involves shifting budgets away from open exchanges into private marketplaces and remunerating agencies on quality of campaign, rather than cheapness. Additionally, the advertiser is looking to understand more about costs and data privacy.

answer: L'Oreal has come to a realization that more and more of the money they were spending in the past on their ads were ending up being wasted without having the desired effect on their target audience. This was reflected in the unproductive CPMs they were getting. The company, however, has no intention of slashing its spend online. Instead, they will spend more on advertising next year. Thus, to avoid cheap impressions, L'Oreal is moving budgets away from open exchanges and into private marketplaces. Another reason for the shift to private marketplaces is to make use of the company's first-party data for more targeted campaigns. The company has decided to buy display ads that are 70% in view on publisher sites. They have also started buying video ads that run through to completion, rather than paying for all impressions. The cosmetics giant has realized that because of the money wasted over time, it has been necessary for L'Oreal to review all their consumer profiles. This also means that L'Oreal will have better access and visibility to who is a real person online.

answer: L'Oréal plans to reduce money wasted on unprofitable media. The company's CEO admitted there is still a lot of waste in the media the advertiser buy's. The company decided it would be too costly and restrictive on reach to have ads 100 percent in view on publisher sites. Buying viewable impressions was the main way they attempted to curb wastage three years ago. The company's crackdown on wastage helps explain its focus on the long tail of advertising.

text: The second sentence's use of the word "advertiser" is confusing - we are not sure if the word refers to L'Oreal or the advertising agencies employed by the company.

refinement: L'Oréal plans to reduce money wasted on unprofitable media. The company's CEO admitted there is still a lot of waste in the type of media the company buys. The company decided it would be too costly and restrictive on reach to have ads 100 percent in view on publisher sites. Buying viewable impressions was the main way they attempted to curb wastage three years ago. The company's crackdown on wastage helps explain its focus on the long tail of advertising.

text: The response does not cover L'Oreal's waste reduction strategy of in-house agencies.

refinement: L'Oréal plans to reduce money wasted on unprofitable media. The company's CEO admitted there is still a lot of waste in the type of media the company buys. The company decided it would be too costly and restrictive on reach to have ads 100 percent in view on publisher sites. Buying viewable impressions was the main way they attempted to curb wastage three years ago. The company's crackdown on wastage helps explain its focus on the long tail of advertising. The company has also planned to employ in-house staff that specializes in advertisement. It plans to use the data obtained by those staff to inform what the company tells external advertising agencies to work.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about effective advertising?

answer: The article discusses how L'Oréal will focus on reducing waste in its advertising to make sure it uses its resources effectively. In particular, the company is moving to more addressable media buys, based on first-party data, and trying to understand the costs associated with its advertising by examining return on investment and attribution modeling. The article also brings attention to the need for talent in data and other specialized fields to help produce more effective campaigns. The takeaway is that effective advertising is based on efficient use of resources.

text: There is no evidence in the passage that shows that the company is planning to bring in talents from fields outside of data and advertising to help its advertising campaigns.

refinement: The article discusses how L'Oréal will focus on reducing waste in its advertising to make sure it uses its resources effectively. In particular, the company is moving to more addressable media buys, based on first-party data, and trying to understand the costs associated with its advertising by examining return on investment and attribution modeling. The article also brings attention to the need for talent in data privacy and advertsing to help produce more effective campaigns. The takeaway is that effective advertising is based on efficient use of resources.

answer: Some companies have decided to slash their online spending to weed out ineffective ads. L'Oréal is instead focusing on where its ads appear. To avoid cheap impressions, their budgets are moving into private marketplaces. The company also decided to buy video ads that run through to completion rather than paying for all impressions. They are using people-based advertising to turn its first-party data into more effective campaigns.

text: - The response ignored one of L'Oreal's strategies to get more out of their external advertising agencies.

refinement: Some companies have decided to slash their online spending to weed out ineffective ads. L'Oréal is instead focusing on where its ads appear. To avoid cheap impressions, their budgets are moving into private marketplaces. The company also decided to buy video ads that run through to completion rather than paying for all impressions. They are using people-based advertising to turn its first-party data into more effective campaigns. Also, the company has decided to recruit in-house data privacy experts to help pinpoint the focus of its advertising needs so it can better challenge its external advertising agency clients on what the company needs.

text: - The word "They" in the last sentence is the wrong pronounce to use for the company.

refinement: Some companies have decided to slash their online spending to weed out ineffective ads. L'Oréal is instead focusing on where its ads appear. To avoid cheap impressions, their budgets are moving into private marketplaces. The company also decided to buy video ads that run through to completion rather than paying for all impressions. L'Oreal is using people-based advertising to turn its first-party data into more effective campaigns. Also, the company has decided to recruit in-house data privacy experts to help pinpoint the focus of its advertising needs so it can better challenge its external advertising agency clients on what the company needs.

answer: No answer

text: There is a lot of points made in the article about effective advertising.

refinement: L'Oreal has seen a lot of waste in its advertisement returns of late. Rather than slash its advert spending like its competitors (Procter and Gamble, Unilever, etc), it has decided to redirect spending from third-party adverts to first-party advertisements. The company now prefers to pay for adverts that are 70 percent in view of on publishers' sites rather than mere impressions that do not contain quality viewers. The company also plans to only pay for video ads that viewers run to completion rather than those skipped. One of L'Oreal's strategies is to hire data privacy experts to work in-house to fine-tune the companies' data and instruct external advertising clients based on the company's findings.

answer: No answer

answer: The article indicates that L'Oréal plans to buy more display and video ads that are viewable, rather than for all impressions. In doing so, the company is focused more on quality than quantity. Though L'Oréal knows that it cannot buy at the same scale as agencies, it is attempting to understand more about its media investments in order to optimize them. Moreover, the advertiser is looking to incentivize agencies to work more efficiently in order to maximize profit.

text: - There is no evidence to support the point on L'Oreal's plans to buy more display and video ads that are viewable.

refinement: The article indicates that L'Oréal plans to buy video ads that are run to completion. In doing so, the company is focused more on quality than quantity. Though L'Oréal knows that it cannot buy at the same scale as agencies, it is attempting to understand more about its media investments in order to optimize them. Moreover, the advertiser is looking to incentivize agencies to work more efficiently in order to maximize profit.

text: - The third sentence is a little bit abstract - it does not detail what exactly L'Oreal is doing to understand its media investments.

refinement: The article indicates that L'Oréal plans to buy video ads that are run to completion. In doing so, the company is focused more on quality than quantity. Though L'Oréal knows that it cannot buy at the same scale as agencies, it is attempting to understand more about its media investments in order to optimize them. the company is doing this by employing data privacy and advertisement experts to better fine-tune its data in order to understand what to focus on, especially when dealing with external advertising agencies. Moreover, the advertiser is looking to incentivize agencies to work more efficiently in order to maximize profit.


text:
The grief of war

My palms are sweating like there was no tomorrow but that was it, there could be no tomorrow for me, this could be the end, my love back home, gone. My family mourning me and the fact everything and everyone I’ve ever loved, gone. My heart starts to beat a thousand times per minute and my thoughts run left to right confusing me at every turn. My mind running wild. The gun fire becomes a shallow hum in the midst of my thoughts then a loud shout breaks them “grab your rifle son, you’re gonna need it!” it was the sergeant major screaming at me. Then the once shallow hum of gun fire became a loud roar of endlessness and screams from those injured.
I reach out to grab my rifle, quivering as I do. Then a firm hand rests on my shoulder I turn my head it is John. I had met John during training, he was a “lost soul” before the army, he used to tell me of how he used to steal cars and redo them and sell them on and how he wasn’t afraid of being shot,  see he’d been shot twice before, once in the left leg and once in the chest and when I asked him how he said “ Well jerry, when you steal from the American mafia you leave with battle scars,” I always wondered how someone could be so careless of anything. He pulls me to my feet and says” Come on jerry, we’re about to charge the Japs,” I just laughed at how casual he was about this but I grabbed my rifle by the stock and held it tight.
Me, john and the rest of the platoon turn to face the sergeant, Alright boys, I’ve just had confirmation that we will be the platoon leading the charge against the Japanese,” My heart sinks beneath my feet and my breath becomes quick gasps for air, my face runs pale then I look across at john and his face lights up with glee along with the others in the platoon. I’m stunned, stunned beyond belief. I shouldn’t be here, and I’m not ready for this, these men they want war, want it more than me, they crave war where as I hid from it all. I can’t do this. I lean over to grab my helmet, trembling with fear as I do. I put it on my head and tighten the strap and think to myself “this is the end.”
“Before you head out you might want to write a note and keep it on your person, this could be it!” the sergeant shouts over the gun fire of the Japs spraying at our temporary trench line. I grab a pen and paper from my front pocket and start writing. To my dearest…. I  shake with fear but I’m determined to finish. “Jerry, we’re heading over!” yells the sergeant. I knew deep down that we wouldn’t be coming home and this was a last ditch attempt for us to take over the island. “But I was going to fight till my last breath,” I told myself.
I raise my head above the trench to scout out what lay ahead, fifty or more japs all committed to their cause “ protect our land, serve our emperor” and they were not about to let us walk right over them. I grip my rifle tight along with the others and we shout in unison “charge!” I leap over the trench screaming at the top of my lungs, I fire at will, forgetting to aim accurately and shooting wildly then something happened, it wasn’t pain nor fear but a euphoric feeling, like nothing mattered anymore, the sound of gun fire became a distant hum. I look across to john running across in the distance then suddenly he falls to his knees and places his hand to his heart and falls flat on the cold hard ground, the sergeant and the others lie lifeless on the ground or are screaming in pain from their injuries. A lone tear runs down my cheek and falls to the ground dragging my vision to my stomach, my uniform is stained bright red then my knees buckle and I drop down to the ground, I grip my stomach tight but I knew this was the end. I reach into my front pocket of my vest and grab my letter griping it ever so tightly but it made me feel safe just knowing that even though I’m gone my family and my wife would be safe. My eyes close then nothing.

Two weeks following the events:
“Mails here!” the mail man yells out “I’m coming, I’m coming Mary yells back. She opens the door and the he hands her a letter “must be important, it’s got an army stamp,” she closes the door and reads the front of the letter “to Mary – Anne jones, U.S army, “ her eyes fill with tears and she begins to tremble with what she knows is inside, the letter revealing the death of her husband. Whilst shaking, she tears open the letter and begins to read.
“We regret to inform you of your loss, first class private Jeromy jones has been killed in battle, he fought valiantly and died for his country,” three tears roll softly from her cheek and her head dips in sadness but the letter goes on say “He was found with a letter addressed to a Mrs Mary – Anne jones,” she reached in to the letter and grabbed a piece of parchment which had been tattered and ripped along the edges but the words were still readable. They wrote,
“To my dearest love,
This will be the last letter I write to you it’s not long because soon after I write this my battalion will be leading the charge against the Japanese. I’ve got low hope I’ll survive but this doesn’t matter now, the fact that does is that you will be safe. I will miss you and our love will be forever, whether I’m there or not.
Love jerry,”
In a brief moment of realisation she then drops the letter and breaks down on her knees and as she began to scream no sound came out, not a hint of noise nor break in the wind she just knelt there mouth wide open, screaming in silence, consumed, in the grief of war.

title: the grief of war

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about why Jerry is scared?

answer: It is the war, and Jerry is afraid he will not survive it. His battalion is leading the charge against the Japanese, and Jerry has low hope he will survive. He sees his friend Jonh, the sergeant, and others killed in the battle.

text: "Jonh" should be "John".

refinement: It is the war, and Jerry is afraid he will not survive it. His battalion is leading the charge against the Japanese, and Jerry has low hope he will survive. He sees his friend John, the sergeant, and others killed in the battle.

answer: Jerry is in a trench, and he's about to charge the Japsthe Americans want to take over the islandand there are 50 or more of them. Jerry doesn't think he's an effective soldier, and if worst comes to worst, he'll die before he's fired a shot. He says gunfire becomes a distant hum as he's frighted and shaking.

text: The last line is unnecessary.

refinement: Jerry is in a trench, and he's about to charge the Japsthe Americans want to take over the islandand there are 50 or more of them. Jerry doesn't think he's an effective soldier, and if worst comes to worst, he'll die before he's fired a shot.

text: Minor grammatical errors.

refinement: Jerry is in a trench, and he's about to charge the Japanese. The Americans want to take over the island and there are 50 or more of the enemy. Jerry doesn't think he's an effective soldier, and if worst comes to worst, he'll die before he's fired a shot.

answer: Jerry states that he feels unprepared to be fighting alongside other soldiers in the war. He also says that he feels like his friends crave the war more than he does. His regiment is to be the platoon leading the charge against the Japanese, and all of the men are excited to do it, although it terrifies Jerry.

answer: Jerry is scared because he knows that he is going into battle against the Japanese and has little hope that he is going to survive. This is the grief of war.

text: The grief of war refers to his wife's grief, not his little hope for survival.

refinement: Jerry is scared because he knows that he is going into battle against the Japanese and has little hope that he is going to survive.

answer: Jerry is scared because he knows he's likely to lose his life in a battle against the Japanese. He struggles with the idea of willingly putting himself in harm's way. He is conflicted because he does not want to fight but the other soldiers in his unit do. He feels scared and extremely vulnerable.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about John?

answer: John is one of the soldiers of the U.S Army. It seems like he is a "lost soul" before the army. He used to steal cars and redo them and sell them on. He was shot twice before, once in the left leg, and once in the chest. He was very careless of things. He helped Jerry by grabbing his hand and pulling him up when Jerry's sergeant was calling all privates to help.

text: The answer should mention John's death.

refinement: John is one of the soldiers of the U.S Army. It seems like he is a "lost soul" before the army. He used to steal cars and redo them and sell them on. He was shot twice before, once in the left leg, and once in the chest. He was very careless of things. He helped Jerry by grabbing his hand and pulling him up when Jerry's sergeant was calling all privates to help. John is killed during the battle against the Japanese.

answer: John is careless and eager for war even though he knows it may be potentially fatal. He is prone to thrill-seeking behavior and finds joy in battle.

text: The answer should mention where John and Jerry met.

refinement: John and Jerry met during training. John is careless and eager for war even though he knows it may be potentially fatal. He is prone to thrill-seeking behavior and finds joy in battle.

text: The answer should mention John's life before the army.

refinement: John and Jerry met during training. John is careless and eager for war even though he knows it may be potentially fatal. He is prone to thrill-seeking behavior and finds joy in battle. John was a lost soul before the army. He used to steal cars and sell them.

text: Should mention John's fearlessness.

refinement: John and Jerry met during training. John is careless and eager for war even though he knows it may be potentially fatal. He is prone to thrill-seeking behavior and finds joy in battle. John was a lost soul before the army. He used to steal cars and sell them. He isn't afraid of being shot, as he was shot before after stealing from the mafia.

text: The answer should mention John's death.

refinement: John and Jerry met during training. John is careless and eager for war even though he knows it may be potentially fatal. He is prone to thrill-seeking behavior and finds joy in battle. John was a lost soul before the army. He used to steal cars and sell them. He isn't afraid of being shot, as he was shot before after stealing from the mafia. John is killed during the battle against the Japanese.

answer: John is a veteran soldier in Jerry's platoon. He used to tell Jerry about how he used to steal cars and change the engines, and how he was once shot in the leg and shot in the chest.

answer: Jerry met John during training. Before the army, John used to steal cars and redo them and sell them on and how he wasn’t afraid of being shot. During a battle, Jerry sees John's face lights up with glee along with the others in the platoon. Jerry is stunned because realizes that John and the others want war. John is killed in the battle.

answer: The story of John is one of bravery, disregard for personal safety, and acceptance of one's fate. He is ready to charge at the enemy with a reckless abandon, despite the horrors of war, because he desires the fight. He is able to easily accept and place himself in danger without hesitation.


text:
The Canadian Amateur Championship, begun in 1895, is the men's amateur golf championship of Canada. It is staged annually by Golf Canada. It was played at match play until 1968, went to stroke play beginning in 1969, and reverted to match play in 1995. It then returned to stroke play in 2008.
 Founding and early years
The Royal Canadian Golf Association was founded in June 1895, at a meeting held in Ottawa by ten charter member clubs, hosted by the Ottawa Golf Club (later the Royal Ottawa Golf Club), and the new organization was granted the prefix 'Royal' in 1896. In conjunction with the meeting, the first men's amateur championship was staged, at match play, with the Governor General, Lord Aberdeen, donating a trophy, the Aberdeen Cup, to the champion. Thomas Harley of Kingston, Ontario won the first championship.
This makes the Canadian Amateur slightly older than the U.S. Amateur, which was first staged later in 1895, and hence the third oldest national amateur championship in the world, after the British Amateur Championship, which began in 1885, and the Australian Amateur in 1894.
The Aberdeen Cup was granted in perpetuity to George Lyon, after he won three straight titles from 1905 to 1907. The original cup was retained by Lyon, but was eventually lost. A new trophy was then provided, the Earl Grey Cup. Lyon would win a total of eight Canadian titles, which is still a record, and he also won the gold medal at golf in the 1904 St. Louis Olympics.
The tournament was held annually until 1914 inclusive, but then was cancelled from 1915 to 1918 because of World War I. It resumed in 1919, and then was staged annually until 1939 inclusive, being cancelled again from 1940 to 1945 because of World War II. It has been held annually since 1946.
 Willingdon Cup
In 1927, the interprovincial team matches, which had begun in 1882, and held 27 times until 1921, between teams from Ontario and Quebec, but then dropped, were resumed with the start of the Willingdon Cup competition, playing for a cup donated by the Governor General, Lord Willingdon. The Willingdon Cup features teams of four top players from each province, and is held on the first two days of the Canadian Amateur, which are also the qualifying days for the balance of the tournament. The Willingdon Cup was also not played from 1940-45.
 Rotation around country
The Canadian Amateur stayed in Ontario and Quebec until 1921, when it went to Manitoba. It went to Alberta for the first time in 1929, to British Columbia for the first time in 1932, to Atlantic Canada for the first time in 1949, and to Saskatchewan for the first time in 1950. Since then, it has rotated around the country's top courses, with the current format allowing each of the six major golf regions (Atlantic Canada, Quebec, Ontario, Manitoba and Saskatchewan, Alberta, and British Columbia) to have its turn on approximately a six-year cycle. Among Canada's ten provinces, only Newfoundland and Labrador has yet to host it.
 Dominant players
The Canadian Amateur was dominated in the 1920s and 1930s by Ross Somerville, who won six titles, finished runner-up four times, and had several more near-misses. Moe Norman won back-to-back titles in 1955 and 1956. Nick Weslock waited until age 40 to win the first of his four titles in 1957. Although Gary Cowan was consistently the best Canadian amateur from the late 1950s into the mid-1970s, he managed to win only one Canadian title, in 1961, but lost in the finals four more times, as well as finishing runner-up twice in stroke play. Doug Roxburgh won his first of four crowns in 1972. Jim Nelford won two in a row from 1975–1976, then narrowly missed a third in 1977, when he lost to Rod Spittle, who won two in a row. Brent Franklin won three in a row from 1985–1987, a feat not seen since Lyon did it some eighty years earlier. Richard Scott won the Canadian title in three years out of four from 2003 to 2006. Cam Burke won two straight from 2008 to 2009.
From the late 1920s into the 1970s, the Canadian Amateur often attracted many of the top American amateurs, several of whom carried the trophy south, including Dick Chapman, Frank Stranahan, Don Cherry, Harvie Ward, Allen Miller, Dick Siderowf, and George Burns. Other leading Americans who competed but fell short include William C. Campbell, Jay Sigel, and Nathaniel Crosby. The Canadian title has also been won by South African Reg Taylor (1962), New Zealanders Stuart Jones (1967) and Gareth Paddison (2001), Mexican Rafael Alarcón (1979), and Australian Gary Simpson (1993).
To date, four players have won both the U.S. Amateur and Canadian Amateur titles: Ross Somerville, Dick Chapman, Harvie Ward, and Gary Cowan. Chapman and Ward also won The Amateur Championship of Great Britain, a title which no Canadian has yet taken.
 Winners who won PGA Tour events
To date, eleven players who won the Canadian Amateur have also won events on the PGA Tour. These eleven (in chronological order of their Canadian Amateur wins) are: Fred Haas, Ken Black, Frank Stranahan, Bunky Henry, Allen Miller, George Burns (golfer), Richard Zokol, Garrett Willis, Dillard Pruitt, Nick Taylor, and Mackenzie Hughes.
Rod Spittle, Canadian Amateur champion in 1977 and 1978, later won an event on the Champions Tour, the 2010 AT&T Championship in San Antonio.
 Most championships hosted
The Toronto Golf Club (1898, 1901, 1903, 1905, 1909, 1913, 1926, 1995, and 2017) and the Royal Ottawa Golf Club (1895, 1899, 1906, 1911, 1914, 1925, 1951, 1991, and 2016) have each hosted nine. Next are Royal Montreal Golf Club with seven (1897, 1900, 1902, 1904, 1908, 1912, and 1931) and Hamilton Golf and Country Club with six (1922, 1927, 1935, 1948, 1977, and 1994).
 Winners

title: Canadian Amateur Championship

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why is the Canadian Amateur Championship moved around Canada?

answer: The Canadian Amateur Championship rotates around the six major golf regions (Atlantic Canada, Quebec, Ontario, Manitoba, and Saskatchewan, Alberta, and British Columbia).

text: The answer could be phrased more clearly to reflect the purpose for the rotation.

refinement: The Canadian Amateur Championship rotates around the six major golf regions (Atlantic Canada, Quebec, Ontario, Manitoba, and Saskatchewan, Alberta, and British Columbia) to allow each of them to have a turn on approximately a six-year cycle.

answer: There are six major golf regions that rotate the field in the country, once every six years.

answer: The Canadian Amateur Championship is moved around the country to give each major golf region the opportunity to host the championship. This is done to give players a chance to compete at the best courses in the country.

text: The second sentence is unattested.

refinement: The Canadian Amateur Championship is moved around the country to give each major golf region the opportunity to host the championship.

answer: The Canadian Amateur Championship is moved around Canada in order to rotate it among the top courses in the country. The goal is to ensure each of the major golf regions has an opportunity to host the tournament.

answer:
The Canadian Amateur Championship was formed in 1895 and was hosted annually until 1914 when World War I hit. It resumed in 1919 until 1940 when World War II started.

Ontario and Quebec have always been the staging grounds of the championship since its inception, however, it was moved to Manitoba in 1921.  Since then Alberta, British Columbia, Atlantic Canada, and Saskatchewan have hosted it, while provinces like Newfoundland and Labrador have yet to host it. The reason behind these moves seems to be linked to the quality of the golf courses in those areas.

text: The first two sentences are irrelevant.

refinement: Ontario and Quebec have always been the staging grounds of the championship since its inception, however, it was moved to Manitoba in 1921.  Since then Alberta, British Columbia, Atlantic Canada, and Saskatchewan have hosted it, while provinces like Newfoundland and Labrador have yet to host it. The reason behind these moves seems to be linked to the quality of the golf courses in those areas.

text: The answer should state that the reason is to give each of the courses a turn hosting.

refinement: Ontario and Quebec have always been the staging grounds of the championship since its inception, however, it was moved to Manitoba in 1921.  Since then Alberta, British Columbia, Atlantic Canada, and Saskatchewan have hosted it, while provinces like Newfoundland and Labrador have yet to host it. The reason behind these moves seems to be to give each of the courses a turn to host on approximately a six-year cycle.


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Starcraft: Marine

I hate the drops. Drops were the worst. The idea behind performing these “tactical insertion operations” is to “selectively disrupt enemy production capability” but most of us jarheads just think of it as a bug stomp. We drop in near a bug hive and kill everything we see, preferably, while the main swarm is off fighting something else, than jump out. Word from intel said that the main swarm was on the move to southern ridge of our base. They had already eaten their way through Camp Eagle and Camp Limley here on Typhon and were itching for a third meal and, since we were the last remnants of Limley, we were tagged with the “opportunity” as Lt. Korvic calls it. So here we were in the APOD-33, me and seven of my buddies jammed in tighter than a porn stars cooze at a gang bang. The only thing that could make it better would be if a flock of Muta’s showed up while we were flying over the canyons. They look like worms with wings, worms that shoot bug bullets out of there asses. I’ve seen these bullets, these “glaive worms” as the brain boys like to call them, make swiss cheese out of the AAV-5 tanks so I could only imagine what they’d do to the APOD. Korvic would love that. I’d probably enjoy it to just to see Korvic’s face as we go down in her precious ship. Bitch. I can’t rag on her though; she keeps the boys alive and is our ride out of here should the shit hit the fan.

Dawn is hitting the eastern side of the ship. Drop time is coming up soon. I bark the command to perform pre-drop prep. Each of my guys reads out the HUD on their medical conditions then they start their own suit diagnostics followed by weapons checks. All of this information is relayed back to my suit which I pass on to Korvic. This was all done prior to loading up but you can never be too sure. I amble my way up to the bow and glance at the windows. It looked completely bright outside but I knew that it really wasn’t. I don’t understand the whole technology behind it but it had something to do with the ships sensors and VR displays or some nonsense.  I could see the hive in the distance, once I focused on it my HUD began restating our mission objectives and highlighting key spots to target. I still haven’t gotten used to seeing these things even after three years in the corps, which, considering the life span of a marine is a long time. A skyscraper made of bruised flesh and bone, once the ship optics focused in you could see that it was crawling with the worm larva. The Intel geeks say that the larvas are “genetically versatile” which meant that they could become almost anything in the swarm, if the right conditions were met. I reminded Korvic to scan the area for any of the growths in the area as a result of those conditions. They say that the growths are similar to tumor. Once the Zerg get wind of opposition around there turf they immediately make some kind of virus which infects one of there worker bugs.  Once the worker bug is ready it becomes a growth feeding off their creep and other shit around the area. The tumor forces the larva to become bigger, badder bugs. They say it’s some kind of “immunal response” from the hive like how white blood cells attack infections in the human body. I don't pretend to understand it, all I know is that blowing up the tumor buildings, yeah buildings, stops them from making meaner bugs. At the base of the hive were cocoons, which lord only knows what was growing inside of them. With my luck it'd be Ultras, big, fanged and armored bastards that could tear through ten marines in a single swipe. Korvic didn't scan any radioactive deposits in the area but I wouldn't rule them out either. The Ultras eat rad deposits or some shit like that and is a strong sign that Ultras might be nearby. West of the hive was our target area, the mineral mines.

Korvic’s telling me that conditions look good. We managed to avoid the max range of there Overlords, the bug eyes in the sky, and the ones hovering near our dropzone were dispatched by Vike’s on an earlier skirmish. SATCOM says Zerg hadn’t had time to replenish their number in this area with the exception of a few hundred drones.  We would be going in undetected to the mines and kill all the drones, no drones no minerals. No minerals no bugs. Simple. I shout at my crew, not that it’s necessary, the audio in our armor can filter out the background noise of the ship, but to get them pissed and ready. I remind them what the bugs have done to us, how they are eating everything they see and that they want to be the toughest sons of bitches in the universe. I remind them that once they hit the four year mark they’ll be pardoned and that all the pussy in the universe will love them and thank them for their service. I see glassy eyes and hear grunts and howls. I can tell Korvic’s pinged there suits for stims. We descend very suddenly, then immediately slow, the APOD is in its vertical take-off state. Korvic and the pilot hit it just right; we are only 10 meters above our DZ. I hear a small compressed whine within my suit. Korvic’s started my stims. As the ramp opens I can see the men stand, helmets closing on their faces, almost foaming at the mouth as the stims take effect. The dawn light hits us and I remember how I came to the corps, how I killed all of those people and that I’m only a year away from my pardon. Why would I want to leave? I can’t give this up. I don't even need the stims to kill. I sight in on the helpless worker bugs, pull the trigger and smile.

title: Starcraft: Marine

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What main event is being described in this story?

answer: The main event is their deployment to the insect hive on Typhon.

answer: The main event being described in this story is of a drop. Many soldiers are packed in together and are waiting for their drop time. The drop time is crucial to their mission objectives and highlighting the key targets.

text: What kind of drop?

refinement: The main event being described in this story is of a drop onto a planet to fight an insect enemy. Many soldiers are packed in together and are waiting for their drop time. The drop time is crucial to their mission objectives and highlighting the key targets.

text: This sentence makes no sense and is unnecessary

refinement: The main event being described in this story is of a drop onto a planet to fight an insect enemy. Many soldiers are packed in together and are waiting for their drop time.

answer: The main event being described in this story is an insertion operation in order to kill worker bugs at the mineral mines.

answer: The main event being described is a tactical insertion operation into a Zerg hive for the purpose of destroying the enemy forces.

answer: The mission is to destroy all of the drones in the area because if the drones are not there, the swarm is not either.

text: Be more specific

refinement: The story is about a mission to destroy all of the insect drones on a planet. The soldiers are on a space-ship waiting for the drop.


text:
_By Annie Aggarwal_

_Photography: Courtesy World Wide Web_

_READ TIME: 1 MIN 30 SECS_

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Have your needs outdone your space? Or are you just plain bored with the way your spaces look and feel? Basically, do you feel the strong urge to redecorate but don’t know how? Check out what we have in store for you…

‘Uplift the humdrum areas of your home into enriching everyday spaces’ is no longer easier said than done. Whilst choices are aplenty, especially with internet baffling you with supposedly ‘new’ designs, a little pragmatic assistance can go a long way in picking furniture, floors and walls to create spaces that reflect individual aesthetic sensibilities.

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We are surrounded by countless choices - some chic, some rustic, some pop and yet others subtle and elegant! Here’s how we can narrow them down:

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COLOUR: Throw a splash of colour using accent pieces, pillows, or paint on a wall, amidst subtle investment furniture. And you have a room fresh as new. __

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TEXTURE adds to the feel of a space. An exterior surface finish can give an organic feel to your interiors, while adding sleek, smooth-finish metallic furniture can lend that touch of sophistication. Mixing a variety of materials – glass and acrylic with exotic woods, can give the space a dimension of eclectic.

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You can always count on FABRICS to add the warmth and comfort you crave in your rooms.  A plush oversized chair or a restful couch can account for a functional makeover of a space. Play with rich drapes and luxurious upholstery to create a more formal setting.

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LIGHTING can effectively highlight or understate. With the variety of lighting options available, the fixtures themselves may act as central focal pieces or they may be subtle, drawing attention to a particularly interesting corner.

The smallest details have the potential to add significant character. A traveller’s home can be an ode to his adventures, a collector’s passion may reflect on his walls, adorned with rare pieces, and a nature enthusiast’s living space can sport a fresh green tinge and flowers changing with the seasons.

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A piece of ART here, a bit of ACCESSORY there, can add intrigue and interest to an otherwise mundane space.

All these elements in harmony with each other can create inspired areas. Possibilities are endless. The best path to choose is the one that leads you to a space you would be delighted to call your own.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize how you can narrow down a style.

answer: At first, there are limitless choices. In simplifying your choices, trim down your options to organic and geometric styles, and then something in for colour.

text: The summary doesn't connect coherently to the text and so requires clarification.

refinement: The author states that when it comes to interior design there are limitless choices. You can simplify your choices by trimming down your options to organic and geometric styles, which you can also do for colour, texture, lighting and accent pieces to reflect one's personality.

answer: According to the narrator, you can add colour via accent pieces, pillows or paint on a wall. A twist on the look can be added by blending textures, while fabric at home can add the warmth and comfort you crave. A traveller's home can be an ode to his adventures, while a collector's passion can be revealed on his walls. There is plenty one can choose from to set a space to suit their personality.

answer: You should aim to feel like you can do something great in the room. You can start with the amount of light, accent pieces, coloring, textures, styles, and fabrics. There is no wrong or right way when it comes to the style of the home. You can choose from a variety of great options. Pick what will bring you the most joy in your home.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize everything relating to furniture.

answer:
Practical assistance in picking furniture, floors, and walls is recommended. Colours and textures add to the richness of a space. Throw a splash of color using accent pieces, pillows, or painted walls, alongside investment furniture. Materials like glass and acrylic with exotic woods, combined with textures like glass, fabric, metal, and other natural elements like wood can be mixed to give a space a particular dimension.
Fixtures themselves can either be central focal pieces or subtle, drawing attention to a particularly interesting corner.
Bright light can enhance or de-emphasize elements of a space. A traveller's home could be an ode to their adventures and a collector's passion could reflect on the walls. Environmental green-tinting and flowers could be used to reflect a nature person's likings. A bit of art here, a piece of accessory there, can also add a unique character. Pick and choose what fits you best and reflects your taste.
A template for a house can be found in any area with some effort and ingenuity.

text: The layout of the text isn't in the form of a summary, instead the text is a copy of what the text says in three paragraphs.

refinement: The text implies that furniture is the final stage after you make all of your other decisions. It references the importance of accent pieces like pillows, decorative items and furniture in a nice location in your room. "Acutely practical" describes how you should match up the furniture. Other materials are mentioned like polished metallic furniture, glass and acrylic and exotic woods.

answer: The text implies that furniture is the final stage after you make all of your other decisions. It references the importance of accent pieces like pillows, decorative items and furniture in a nice location in your room. "Acutely practical" describes how you should match up the furniture. Other materials are mentioned like polished metallic furniture, glass and acrylic and exotic woods.

answer: The text implies that furniture is the final stage after you make all of your other decisions. It references the importance of accent pieces like pillows, decorative items, and furniture in a nice location in your room. "Acutely practical" describes how you should match up the furniture. Other materials are mentioned like polished metallic furniture, glass and acrylic, and exotic woods.

answer: The article details several design styles for furniture, noting that the color, fabric and how furniture appears are three key elements to consider when furnishing a space. Throw a splash of color through accent pieces and pillows, while adding exotic woods, exotic metals, and glass and acrylic with finishes ranging from sleek, smooth finishes to more organic textures like fabric.

answer: The article details several design styles for furniture, noting that the color, fabric and the materials furniture is made of are three key elements to consider when furnishing a space. Throw a splash of color through accent pieces and pillows, while adding exotic woods, exotic metals, and glass and acrylic with finishes ranging from sleek, smooth finishes to more organic textures like fabric.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize everything relating to color.

answer: Choose a color that contrasts with the accent walls, if you are trying to make an impact. Choose a color for your accessories such as pillows, that compliments the main color scheme of your room. Bring in a splash of color using accent pieces or painting accessories. You can also invest in metallic furniture to give a room a sophisticated feel.

answer:
Below is a list of things that should be avoided color-wise:
- Black on blue spaces if your furniture or accent color
- Colors in the pastel and floral categories if the main color of the room is blue, - Red rooms don't go well with prints, rugs, and black
- Fluorescent-bright shade in rooms with natural light
- Change your flooring fuchsia to white/gold.
- Choose a sunny yellow shade vs. coral if the main color of the room is blue

text: This response does not reflect the text.

refinement: Color can set a particular mood. Throw a splash of color using accent pieces or pillows.

answer: Color can set a particular mood. Throw a splash of color using accent pieces or pillows.

answer: Lighting can bring attention to a particularly interesting corner. A traveler's home can be an ode to his adventures, a collector's passion may reflect on his walls, adorned with rare pieces, and a nature enthusiast's living space can sport a fresh green tinge. Color can set a particular mood. You can throw a splash color. Throw a splash of color using accent pieces or pillows.

text: Only the last three sentences are relevant.

refinement: Color can set a particular mood. You can throw a splash color. Throw a splash of color using accent pieces or pillows.

text: Remove repetition.

refinement: Color can set a particular mood. You can throw a splash of color using accent pieces or pillows.

answer:
Below is a list of things that should be avoided colorwise:
- Black on blue spaces if your furniture or accent color

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about rugs?

answer: No answer

answer: Nothing in the article explicitly mentions the use of a rug, but it may be implied to be a backdrop tool used to add effect to a room and can play with light and color.

answer: Rugs can help with texture, but in an abstract way.

text: The article makes no mention of rugs helping in an abstract way, though it can be inferred, this needs to be stated in the response.

refinement: Nothing in the article explicitly mentions the use of a rug, but it may be implied to be a backdrop tool used to add effect to a room and can play with light and color.

answer: No answer


text:
     It's funny how people act in the coffee rooms at funeral homes. They're all sad or they act sad out of respect. They all drink coffee and eat the cookies that they put out on the table, and they talk about how the body looks for a while, then they start talking about politics or the weather or some damn boring thing. It happens at every viewing I've ever been to. I even do it. I sat there the other night at my great aunts viewing and I nodded my head when people talked about how natural she looked and all that, and I ate three big cookie, then I looked down at my gut and was disgusted because I'm a damn glutton.
	Anyways, two things happened when we all left the funeral home: the first thing was I offered to be a pallbearer. It was my great aunt Margret's viewing, like I said, and my grandma said that me or my brother ought to be pallbearers. My brother's real nervous about some things, one of them is being around dead people. He was afraid he'd drop the casket or something, so I offered to do it, but Margret's niece said no. She told my grandma later that the reason she said no was because I looked like a clown because of my hair. I have long shaggy hair that I dye blood red.
     The second thing is that I noticed the damn Christmas tree in the corner near the door in the lobby -- it's getting close to Christmas now. It was tall and green and decorated in bright white lights and silver tinsel and big red bulbs with the names of all the dead people who were shown there that year written on them with permanent marker. I saw Margret's name in the center.
	I thought it was sort of strange, decorating the tree with the dead. I think that funeral homes are strange altogether. When you die everybody you ever met practically comes and cries and get all sad at the site of your leftover meat.
	When I got back home I started over to my friend Darren's house.
	Darren and I have went to school together since fourth grade, but we just started hanging out this year because we've always ran with different crowds. His friends are the kind of guys that wear gym shorts all year long and lust after Air Jordans and Beats Headphones and try to punk out everybody so they can feel tough. Plus, we've never had any classes together or anything until this year, but Darren's probably my favorite friend.
      The only problem with us hanging out is that he smokes a lot of weed and he's got me smoking a lot too. Last weekend we blew fifteen bucks on weed, smoked it all and stayed up until four listening to The Beatles.
	He's never listened to much music outside of rap, so I've been trying to show him some good stuff. He always acts like he likes it, but he's probably just entertaining me. He's probably just telling me he likes it because we're friends and he's nice. Darren's a real nice sensitive guy under all that wanna-be-thug shit he's always doing. He's nicer than me in a lot of ways, like when he's listening to rap and I don't like it, I tell him and bitch until he turns it off, and when he turns it off, he isn't even mad about having to doing it because he's real considerate. I wish I was that considerate.
	Anyways, Darren and I ended up going down to the cemetery and smoking a fat joint. I told him about the funeral home Christmas tree and he said that the funeral home was retarded.
	"They won't be putting my name on some damn bulb," he said. Then he talked about the rapture through the rest of the cemetery. He told me that we weren't going to have to worry about funerals because we weren't really going to die because we  were going up in the rapture. Darren was always talking about the rapture. He never went to church, but he had all the faith
in the world that the rapture was going to happen at any minute and he had all the faith in the world that the two of us were going.
	He told me once that I'm the only friend he likes to talk to about the rapture. It was probably because I'm the only one
who will even listen. I don't believe in the Bible, but I don't mind talking about Bible stuff if I care about the person doing most of the talking.
	If Heaven exists, Darren will go because he's nice and sensitive. If there's a Heaven, Margret's there because she was a real sweet lady. It's a nice idea, the idea of Heaven, I mean. I guess I'd rather float up to a cloud kingdom than to get old and die and be buried in a boxes.
	Anyways, I'm not sure why he thinks I'm going to Heaven.
	Once we got out of the cemetery, we saw this old tin can in the middle of the street, and the street was empty because it was about nine at night or later and it was cold and everybody besides the two of us were inside around heater and wrap in blankets, probably. Anyways, we started kicking the can down this alley and we kept falling down and laughing because we were stoned.
	We kept on kicking the can down the alleys until I had to piss. I went behind this old white shed, unbuttoned my pants and
unzipped and started pissing. There was this Oldsmobile behind me, it was parked on the other side of the alley, I thought it was empty because it was dark and I couldn't see through the
windows. Well, somebody was in it, and halfway through my piss, whoever it was  beeped the horn and scared me half to death,
 and I ended up pissing down my leg. I zipped up my pants and Darren and I got the hell out of the alley as fast as we could. It was funny, though. I didn't even mind the piss on my leg that much.

title: [UR] Funeral Home Christmas Tree

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about the type of person Darren is?

answer: The story portrays Darren as a sensitive, considerate person. He listens to music his friend finds meaningful, and he is always open to discussing matters of faith and the afterlife. By contrast, the protagonist also recognizes that Darren behaves differently from him: whereas the protagonist is easily irritated, Darren is patient and kind.

answer: Darren is a nice guy who listens to his friend as they share their stories and viewpoints. He's a sensitive guy under all the thug talk, and he's considerate when it comes to his friend's opinions. Darren has all the faith in the world in the rapture, and he believes only those who have a pure heart, such as himself, will make it to heaven. It seems Darren has never tried to go against the temptations he was always exposed to on the streets.

answer: Darren is a kind guy who is sensitive and considerate. He enjoys cannabis and would talk about the rapture. He lacks faith in the church and has strong faith in the Bible and in the rapture.

text: Darren does not lack faith in the church he simply does not attend, and there is no mention in the story about his faith in the bible.

refinement: Darren is a kind guy who is sensitive and considerate. He enjoys cannabis and would talk about the rapture, which he has a strong faith will happen.

answer: The story suggests that Darren is a considerate and sensitive person. Despite being of a different crowd and listening to different music, Darren is able to show compassion for others, even in times of hardship. Darren also sees the absurdity in the funeral home Christmas tree, and the two spend time having fun in the cemetery. It is clear that Darren is a kind, sweet person.

answer: Darren smokes a lot of weed. He pretends to like the narrator's music because they're friends and he's nice. He's a sensitive guy under his wannabe-thug persona. He turns off his rap music when the narrator says he doesn't like it, and isn't mad about it because he's considerate. He's always talking about the rapture, even though he never goes to church. The narrator believes that if Heaven exists, Darren would go.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize everything relating to the narrator's family.

answer: The narrator attends the viewing for his great aunt Margret. His grandma said that he or his broughter ought to be pall bearers. Since his brother was afraid of dropping the casket, the narrator offered to do it, but Margret's niece declined. The narrator believes Margret is in Heaven because she was a real sweet lady.

text: Revise 'broughter' to 'brother'

refinement: The narrator attends the viewing for his great aunt Margret. His grandma said that he or his brother ought to be pallbearers. Since his brother was afraid of dropping the casket, the narrator offered to do it, but Margret's niece declined. The narrator believes Margret is in Heaven because she was a real sweet lady.

answer: The narrator is related to Margret. He seems to live with their grandmother and brother. Their father lives separately, not being mentioned in this text.

text: There is no mention of the father in the text, as stated by the response, so any assertions about him are null.

refinement: The narrator is related to Margret. He seems to live with their grandmother and brother.

answer: The narrator's great aunt Margret died, and at her viewing the narrator volunteered to be a pallbearer. There was also a Christmas tree set up in the lobby of the funeral home with names of dead people written on the bulbs. The narrator and Darren went down to the cemetery to smoke a joint, and the oldsmobile parked there scared the narrator while he was urinating. The narrator's family seems to consist mostly of relatives who have passed away.

text: The response covers too much and does not focus on the narrator's family as requested by the prompt.

refinement: The narrator's great Aunt Margaret died, and at her viewing the narrator volunteered to be a pallbearer, Margaret's niece refused as they thought the narrator looked like a clown. The narrator's family seems to consist mostly of relatives who have passed away.

text: There is nothing in the text to suggest most of the narrator's family is dead.

refinement: The narrator's great Aunt Margaret died, and at her viewing the narrator volunteered to be a pallbearer, Margaret's niece refused as they thought the narrator looked like a clown.

answer: The narrator's grandma says she says either him or his brother ought to be pallbearers at her great aunt Margret's viewing. They went to the cemetery together to smoke pot and talk about the rapture where the narrator starts kicking a tin can. His friend Darren kept talking about the rapture and they kept talking until they got back and they got in the Olds near the white shed.

text: The response covers too much and does not focus on the narrator's family as requested by the prompt.

refinement: The narrator attends the viewing for his great aunt Margret. His grandma said that he or his brother ought to be pallbearers. Since his brother was afraid of dropping the casket, the narrator offered to do it, but Margret's niece declined. The narrator believes Margret is in Heaven because she was a real sweet lady.

answer:
The narrator's great aunt Margret died, and the viewer attendees discussed the body and other mundane topics. The narrator then noticed the funeral home's Christmas tree and found the decorations morbid and strange.

The narrator's family consists of the narrator and their brother, as well as their great aunt Margret. The family is predominantly composed of older people and the narrator's brother is nervous around dead people. Though the narrator considers himself nice, Darren is even nicer. The narrator and Darren got stoned and observed a tin can in the street, and the narrator eventually urinated against a white shed, which caused someone to honk their car horn and scare the narrator. The narrator does not mind the resulting urine on their leg, which is indicative of their generally good-hearted nature.

text: All mention of Darren is unnecessary.

refinement:
The narrator's great aunt Margret died, and the viewer attendees discussed the body and other mundane topics. The narrator then noticed the funeral home's Christmas tree and found the decorations morbid and strange.

The narrator's family consists of the narrator and their brother, as well as their great aunt Margret. The family is predominantly composed of older people and the narrator's brother is nervous around dead people.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the narrator's movements after he meets up with Darren.

answer: After meeting up with his friend Darren, the narrator goes to the cemetery and smokes a joint, then goes for a walk afterward. While walking, the narrator finds a tin can in the street, and as he is peeing behind an empty car, the car's horn is accidentally blown, causing him to piss on himself.

answer: After the narrator and Darren meet, they meet up with his friend at the cemetery to smoke a joint. They walk a bit and when they leave the cemetery, go to kick a tin can back to Darren's place until the narrator needs to go to the bathroom.

text: Only Darren and the narrator meet to smoke a joint.

refinement: The narrator and Darren meet in a cemetery to smoke a joint, they walk a bit and when they leave the cemetery, go to kick a tin can back to Darren's place until the narrator needs to go to the bathroom.

text: A little more detail about the end of the journey would help clarity.

refinement: The narrator and Darren meet in a cemetery to smoke a joint, they walk a bit and when they leave the cemetery, go to kick a tin can back to Darren's place until the narrator needs to go to the bathroom and does so behind an Oldsmobile, and when it beeps they run away.

answer: The narrator meets with Darren at Darren's house. They go to the cemetery. Once they exit the cemetery, they kick a can down an alley. The narrator goes behind an old white shed to pee. When the narrator realizes there is someone in the car parked on the other side of the alley, he and Darren run away as fast as they can.

answer: The narrator went to Darren's house and smoked a joint together. While walking back from the cemetery, the narrator sees a funeral home Christmas tree and is disturbed by it. After kicking a tin can around an alley, the narrator ends up pissing down his leg when a car honks at him. Despite the pee, the narrator doesn't mind too much.

text: Details in the response do not accurately reflect the text.

refinement: The narrator and Darren walk back from the cemetery after smoking a joint. Once they leave the cemetery they kick a tin can around an alley, the narrator goes to the bathroom behind a car but ends up pissing down his leg when the car honks at him.

answer: The two go to a cemetery directly after visiting the funeral home and smoking a joint. Darren convinces the narrator that his drug-use and bad behavior "isn't that bad" while encouraging him to follow in those footsteps. After visiting the cemetery, the two hang out kicking a tin can until the narrator pisses and causes it to fall, causing the narrator to pee himself.

text: Summary is inaccurate overall and offers unnecessary details that do not reflect the prompt.

refinement: The two go to a cemetery and smoking a joint. After visiting the cemetery, the two hang out kicking a tin can until the narrator pisses behind a car which beeps its horn, causing the narrator to pee on himself before the pair run away.


text: It's 5:00 AM when Barney's alarm goes off on his clock.  Instinctively, he slammed his hand on the clock and set the alarm off for another five minutes.  "Hey, honey, you should probably wake up."  A soft and tired sounding voice says.  Barney glances over at his wife Olivia.  "Huh, oh, yeah, thanks honey."  Barney says, looking back over and feeling the nightstand for his glasses.  He brushes his hands across the table, and here's a soft clicking noise on the ground.  "Ugh"  Barney groans.  "Here honey, let me get those for you."  Olivia says, getting out of bed.  She slowly and tiredly walks over to the other side of the bed.  She bends over and picks up Barneys glasses.  "Thanks babe."  Barney says, fixing his glasses over his eyes.  "Now you'd better get going, baby, or else you'll be late to work."  Olivia reminds him.  "Ok, thanks hun."  Barney says leaning in for a kiss from his wife.  They peck each other on the lips, and Barney turns and walks into the closes.  He changes out of his pajamas into his suit.  "Hey honey, which tie should i wear today, the blue one, or the red one?"  Barney asks Olivia.  "You know i always thought that red tie looked sexy on you, baby.  Wear that one."  Olivia replies, not bothering to look up.  Barney fixes the tie around his neck and ties it.  Barney walks out into the hallway outside their bedroom.  Barney looks at the clock.  He immediately perks up as he reads the clock.  "6:00!?  Honey, why'd you let me sleep in so long!?"  He yells to his wife.  "I'm sorry babe, you just looked so cute sleeping there."  She responds.  Barney sighs.  He quickly walks down the stairs.  He slipped his shoes on, tightened his tie one last time, opened the door, and stepped out onto his porch.  He quickly walks over to his car.  He pulls his car keys out of his inside pocket.  Already the sun was beginning to heat up his dark black suit.  He opens the driver door and gets in.  He jams the keys into the ignition and turns it.  The motor roars, then quits down.  Barney adjusts the mirror so he can see himself.  He strokes his stubble of a beard and slightly adjusts his hair, then looks behind him and begins to back out.  His tires bump on the gutter.  He steers so he turns left, and begins to drive.  "Thank god work is just a block or two away."  Barney says to himself.  He takes a left turn, then a right turn, then stops at a small house building.  He gets out of the car, and walks up to the front door.  Glancing behind his shoulder, Barney knocks on the door three times, then rings the doorbell twice, and inserts one of the keys on his key ring into the lock, turns it, and pushes the door open.  Four armed guards await him inside.  "Nice to see you Barney, we'll just scan your ID card, check you for weaponry, and you can go right on ahead.  One of the guards says.  "Alright, nice to see you to."  Barney replies.  He shows them his ID.  One of the guards scans it, then tells him to step through the metal scanner.  Nothing serious happens.  "Alright Barney, you're free to go.  By the way, Amy said they made a serious breakthrough."  the guard standing near the scanner says.  "Ok, thank you, i'll go talk to her."  Barney says.  He walks into an elevator.  "Please scan."  A woman's voice in the elevator says.  Barney places his eye's up against a scanner.  "Welcome Barney."  The voice says.  The elevator door closes, and begins going down.  Some boring elevator music plays in the back round.  Barney taps his feed and whistles.  Suddenly, the elevator lurches to a halt.  "Final destination.  Have a safe day."  The woman's voice says.  Barney steps out of the elevator into a grayish metallic room.  "Ah, Barney, great thing your here!"  A woman with dark black hair says.  "Yeah, Rick told me upstairs that you figured something out."  Barney replies.  "Oh my god, yes!  Look at this!"  The black haired woman says.  She presses a button and a metal wall opens up, revealing Andrew, one of Barneys colleagues, standing in a small pod.  "What is Andrew doing in there!?  I thought the rapid transportation tube was off limits after what happened to Johnn!?"  Barney exclaims, butterflies in his stomach.  "It was, until we figured this out, watch this."  The black haired woman says, pressing a button.  The Rapid Transportation tube, or RTT, begins to spin.  Faster and faster it spins until a loud shocking sound and a bright flash occurs, and when Barney looks back and Andrew is gone.  Barney stares for a while.  "Where did he go?"  He says, worry in his voice.  "Amy, where did he go!?"  Barney says, looking at Amy.  Amy sat there with a grin on here face, her hands locked together.  Suddenly, another loud shock and a flash.  When Barney looked this time, Andrew was back.  "See, it still works.  But better yet, it allows you to travel through TIME!"  Amy says excitedly.  "What, no way!"  Barney says.  "Andrew, is this true?"  He says, turning to Andrew.  "Hell yeah it is.  You wanna give it a spin?"  Andrew says, getting out of the RTT.  "You better believe it!"  Barney says, rushing to the door.  He inputs the code.  "Five...  Nine...  Seven...  Two..."  He says.  The door slowly opens, and Barney steps in.  "It's all yours, man."  Andrew says, stepping out of the room.  Barney steps into the RTT.  "Alright Barney, when and where do you want to go.  It should only last for a while.  Maybe three minutes."  Amy says.  Suddenly, the sound of gunshots through the vent silences the room.  "What the hell was that?"  Andrew says.  "I...  I don't know."  Amy says, rushing over to the intercom.  "Hello, whats going on up there?"  Suddenly, the elevator door opens.  Three men step out.  One is wielding a black painted AK-47, one pumps a SPAS-12, and the one in the center lifts up a Type 88 LMG.  The lab is suddenly loud with gunshots.  Amy and Andrew both crumple to the floor.  "Nooo!  You fuckers!"  Barney yells.  The AK-47 wielding terrorist looks up.  "Oh, look at the little nerd inside his toy."  He walks over and looks at the console.  "Hey, how much you wanna bet i can make this thing blow up?"  He says.  "You bastard!"  Barney yells.  "Eh, 20 bucks."  The SPAS terrorist says.  The man with the AK lights up the console.  Suddenly, the RTT begins spinning rapidly.  Faster than it should.  Barney can't take the spinning anymore.  He begins to feel faint.  Darkness closes in on him.  Faster and faster he spins, until eventually, all is dark.

title: [SF] Nothing went according to plan at all. [PART 1]

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Identify some of the issues in the given narrative sample.

answer: Structurally, there is one issue: there are no line breaks, this makes the text look dense and difficult to read. For the narrative, the main character's home is too close (literally two blocks away) from what appears to be a top secret facility.

text: First line is enough, well done.

refinement: Structurally, there is one issue: there are no line breaks, this makes the text look dense and difficult to read.

answer: Namely, breaches in security.

answer: The primary issue in this narrative sample is the danger that occurs within the laboratory. There is a battle underway among some armed terrorists and Amy and Andrew, two colleagues of Barney. Amy and Andrew are both injured, and once Barney enters the RTT, he falls unconscious. There is a risk to Barney himself, who could be harmed if the RTT spins too fast. There are also concerns about the lab itself being prone to disaster due to terrorism.

answer: The main issues presented in the narrative sample are neglect, danger, and action. The neglect from Barney's wife allows Barney to sleep in, even though he risks being late to work. This results in his getting into dangerous situations later on in the narrative. Upon entering the RTT, Barney overhears gunshots and upon closer inspection, finds that both Amy and Andrew are injured, and then is targeted by terrorists. The danger causes Barney to faint and the RTT starts spinning faster than it should. This leads to a situation where all is dark.

text: Barney is an adult it is not his wife's job to pick a tie for him or wake him up.

refinement: The main issues presented in the narrative sample are danger, and action. This results in his getting into dangerous situations later on in the narrative. Upon entering the RTT, Barney overhears gunshots and upon closer inspection, finds that both Amy and Andrew are injured, and then is targeted by terrorists. The danger causes Barney to faint and the RTT starts spinning faster than it should. Everything goes dark after that.

answer: Barney misses a deadline to get to work because he overslept and didn't have time to properly get dressed. His wife, Olivia is the one who wakes him. He is running against the clock and doesn't eat anything before leaving. His first job is to fill out his schedule.

text: Mention the terrorists

refinement: Barney misses a deadline to get to work because he overslept and didn't have time to properly get dressed. His wife, Olivia is the one who wakes him. He is running against the clock and doesn't eat anything before leaving. Then a group of terrorists storm Barney's workplace.