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STACEY MARINKOVICH (born 25 February 1981), previously known as STACEY ROSMAN, is an Australian netball coach and former player. During the Commonwealth Bank Trophy era she played for Queensland Firebirds and Perth Orioles. In the ANZ Championship era she played for West Coast Fever. She captained both Orioles and Fever. After retiring as a player, Rosman became a coach. In 2014 she was appointed head coach of West Coast Fever. In 2018 she guided Fever to their first ever grand final. She was subsequently named Coach of the Year. In 2020 Rosman, now Marinkovich, was appointed head coach of the Australia national netball team.

Early life and family

Rosman is originally from Queensland and was raised in South Brisbane. She is the oldest of four siblings and has two sisters and a brother. She is married to Lindsay Marinkovich and has one son, Matthew, born in December 2019.[1][2][3]

Playing career

AIS

During the 1999 season, Rosman played for the Australian Institute of Sport. She was coached by Norma Plummer and her team mates included Demelza Fellowes and Cynna Neele.[4]

Queensland Firebirds

Between 2000 and 2001, Rosman made 18 appearances for Queensland Firebirds in the Commonwealth Bank Trophy.[5][6]

Perth Orioles

Between 2002 and 2007, Rosman made 71 appearances for Perth Orioles in the Commonwealth Bank Trophy. She captained Orioles during the 2006 and 2007 seasons. Her Orioles team mates included Caitlin Bassett, Kate Beveridge, Susan Fuhrmann, Jessica Shynn and Larrissa Willcox.[7][8][9][10]

West Coast Fever

During the 2008 and 2009 ANZ Championship seasons, Rosman played for West Coast Fever. Rosman captained Fever during the 2008 season. During the 2008 season she also made her 100th Commonwealth Bank Trophy/ANZ Championship appearance. She retired as a player at the end of the 2009 season.[11][12][13][14]

Coaching career

Western Sting

During the 2013 and 2014 seasons, Rosman served as head coach of Western Sting in the Australian Netball League. During the 2014 season she guided them to third place in the league.[15][16][17]

West Coast Fever

During the 2012 and 2013 ANZ Championship seasons, Rosman served an assistant coach to Norma Plummer at West Coast Fever. In 2014 she succeeded Plummer as the Fever head coach.[18][19][20][21] In 2015 Rosman guided Fever to third place in the Australian Conference. She was subsequently named as the head coach in the 2015 ANZ Championship All-Star Team.[22][23][24][25] In August 2016 she signed a new four-year deal to remain as Fever coach.[26] During the 2018 Suncorp Super Netball season Rosman, now Marinkovich, guided Fever to their first ever grand final.[27][28][29] She was subsequently named Coach of the Year.[30][31][32]

Australia

In August 2020 Marinkovich was appointed head coach of the Australia national netball team, succeeding Lisa Alexander.[33][34][35][36][37] Marinkovich has previously worked as a coach with the national team in various capacities, including coaching the Australian Fast5 Flyers team at the 2017 Fast5 Netball World Series.[38][39]

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Honours

Head coach

Individual Awards

-   COACH OF THE YEAR
    -   2018

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title: Stacey Marinkovich

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize everything relating to Rosman's team mates.

answer: Rosman made 18 appearances for Queensland Firebirds in the Commonwealth Bank Trophy, making 18 appearances alongside Demelza Fellowes and Cynna Neele. Rosman made 71 appearances for Perth Orioles in the Commonwealth Bank Trophy, during which her team mates included Caitlin Bassett, Kate Beveridge, Susan Fuhrmann, Jessica Shynn, and Larrissa Willcox. Rosman captained West Coast Fever during the 2008 and 2009 ANZ Championship seasons, when her team mates included Jessica Shynn, and Caitlin Bassett, Kate Beveridge, and Susan Fuhrmann.

text: The last sentence is no longer necessary since it is the same teammates mentioned.

refinement: Rosman made 18 appearances for Queensland Firebirds in the Commonwealth Bank Trophy, making 18 appearances alongside Demelza Fellowes and Cynna Neele. Rosman made 71 appearances for Perth Orioles in the Commonwealth Bank Trophy, during which her team mates included Caitlin Bassett, Kate Beveridge, Susan Fuhrmann, Jessica Shynn, and Larrissa Willcox.

answer: Rosman played in various netball competitions during the Commonwealth Bank Trophy and the ANZ Championship eras, but she primarily played for teams from Queensland and Perth. During the Commonwealth Bank Trophy era she played for Queensland Firebirds. Her Perth Orioles team mates included Caitlin Bassett, Kate Beveridge, Susan Fuhrmann, Jessica Shynn, and Larrissa Willcox. During the ANZ Championship era, Rosman played for West Coast Fever. She notably captained both teams. Rosman also worked as an assistant coach during the 2012 and 2013 ANZ Championship seasons and she became head coach of West Coast Fever in 2014. Her West Coast Fever team mates included several notable players, including Bassett and Shynn. Finally, in 2020, Marinkovich was appointed head coach of the Australian national netball team.

text: Needs to focus on the teammates.

refinement: Rosman made 18 appearances for Queensland Firebirds in the Commonwealth Bank Trophy, making 18 appearances alongside Demelza Fellowes and Cynna Neele. Rosman made 71 appearances for Perth Orioles in the Commonwealth Bank Trophy, during which her team mates included Caitlin Bassett, Kate Beveridge, Susan Fuhrmann, Jessica Shynn, and Larrissa Willcox.

answer: During the Commonwealth Bank Trophy era Rosman played for Queensland Firebirds and Perth Orioles. While playing for Perth Orioles between 2002 and 2007, Rosman captained the team. Her team mates included Caitlin Bassett, Kate Beveridge, Susan Fuhrmann, Jessica Shynn, and Larrissa Willcox. During the 2008 and 2009 ANZ Championship seasons Rosman played for West Coast Fever and served as the team's captain in 2008. Her team mates included Lisa Alexander, Demelza Fellowes, Cynna Neele, Demi Stokes, and Lauren Brazzale.

text: Some of the information is inaccurate and some are not needed for the answer.

refinement: During the Commonwealth Bank Trophy era Rosman played for Queensland Firebirds and Perth Orioles. While playing for Perth Orioles between 2002 and 2007, Rosman captained the team. Her team mates included Caitlin Bassett, Kate Beveridge, Susan Fuhrmann, Jessica Shynn, and Larrissa Willcox.

answer:
Rosman is the eldest of four siblings but she only played with three other players besides her brother during her time as a player. Rosman first played with Demelza Fellowes and Cynna Neele when she was coached by Norma Plummer of the Australian Institute of Sport.
Rosman later played with a Perth Orioles team that featured Caitlin Bassett, Kate Beveridge, Susan Fuhrmann, Jessica Shynn, and Larrissa Willcox. She also played with Caitlin Bassett, Susan Fuhrmann, and Larrissa Willcox again when she was hired as an assistant coach at West Coast Fever.

answer: At the Australian Institute of Sport, her team mates included Demelza Fellowes and Cynna Neele. Her Orioles team mates included Caitlin Bassett, Kate Beveridge, Susan Fuhrmann, Jessica Shynn, and Larrissa Willcox.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize Rosman's coaching career.

answer: After retiring as a player, Rosman became a coach. She served as head coach for Western Sting in the Australian Netball League in 2013 and 2014. In 2014 she was appointed head coach for West Coast Fever. Under her guidance, West Coast Fever reached their first ever grand final in the 2018 Suncorp Super Netball season. In 2020, Rosman was appointed head coach of the Australia national netball team.

answer: Rosman became a coach after retiring as a player. During the 2013 and 2014 seasons, she served as head coach of Western Sting in the Australian Netball League. During the 2012 and 2013 ANZ Championship seasons, she served as assistant coach to Norma Plummer at West Coast Fever. She succeeded Plummer as head coach in 2014. She was then named head coach in the 2015 ANZ Championship All-Star Team. She signed a new four-year deal to remain as Fever coach in 2016 and was named Coach of the Year in 2018. In 2020, she was appointed head coach of the Australia national netball team.

answer: Rosman is an Australian netball coach and former player. She made 18 appearances for Queensland Firebirds during the 1999 season. She then went on to play 71 appearances for Perth Orioles between 2002 and 2007, and captained them during 2006 and 2007. After her playing career ended, Rosman became a coach. She coached Western Sting in the Australian Netball League, and then West Coast Fever. Marinkovich was appointed head coach of the Australia national netball team in 2020.

answer: Rosman has experience as both player and assistant coach at the Australian Netball League and ANZ Championship levels. In 2014 she became head coach of West Coast Fever and has since led them to their first ever grand final. In August 2020 Rosman was appointed head coach of the Australia national netball team.

answer: Rosman was named head coach of West Coast Fever in 2014.  She made history that year by becoming the first woman to head coach a team that won the Australian Conference. In 2015, she was named head coach in the 2015 ANZ Championship All Star Team. In 2020, she became the head coach for the Australia national netball team, succeeding Lisa Alexander.


split: train

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I don’t remember how I got there or where it started. So, in a way, it started off like most dreams do. I was running. But not in solidarity; with a group. I wasn’t exactly sure who they were, I just felt a deep camaraderie with them as if they were close to me. It’s hard to explain. None the less, we trekked on. The barren, gray landscape made me feel empty and thirsty inside, like I knew something better than this was out there somewhere. Or was it somewhere in the past? Was this the aftermath of a dispute between our territory’s leader with another? Regardless, I knew that there was something better than this. It was eating at me.

We ran for what seemed like hours, passing abandoned houses, ransacked for their valuables. Finally, we stopped in a small neighborhood. Three houses stood there seemingly untouched by the madness of what the earth was now. It was a comforting feeling to be back home. We set down our valuables and watched the sun slowly make its dissent over the orange horizon. We felt closer than we ever have before to each other. Quickly afterwards, we all wished each other good night. I lied in my bed wishing for this to be over. Whatever “this” was, I don’t know.

The next morning, I awoke with a kick of my own leg. This seems to happen every time I die in a dream.

The rest of my group awoke, and we packed up again. This time though, we carried only the necessities as if we would come back. Maybe I could call this place home again. It’s been so long since I could. I kept that from the others. I found it difficult to show much weakness to them. Not now. One must be callused and strong in these times.

The morning sun was beautiful, it was the only thing that gave me hope, as we marched onward. We didn’t talk about the past much, but when we did, It was certainly a touchy subject. You can only joke and play around for so long before conversion turns serious. It’s what we needed to keep sane, none the less, as we walked on this abandoned interstate. The hours were long, but I felt as if we were coming up to something big..something worth our while. Just then, our leader, average in height with a weathered face and wrinkly brow, raised his binoculars that hung around his neck. He trembled as he said, “There! Over there! Something… miraculous!”. Every one of us immediately perked up at the thought and made a mad dash towards the undiscovered locale.

We stopped and gazed in awe of what we saw, a large neighborhood of houses. What struck them as odd though was their toy-like appearance. The orange and green houses looked almost gelatin-like. Maybe they were? Relishing at the thought, I was the first one down the steep hill that separated me and this mysterious village, but before I could make it, a married couple from my group had already beaten me there and had sunken into the gelatin-made streets. It was the most peculiar thing we had all ever seen, but at the same instant, it was beautiful. We laughed, and we became children again. I didn’t look back or even think of the home that I left behind.

At that very moment, my leg kicked. I awoke in my bedroom; It was all a dream.

**Note:** I am in high school and a very amateur writer, and I'm sure that is apparent by my grammar. I would love to hear some feedback though. The good and the bad, I want it all! Thank you!

title: A dream that I had.

question: Where is the story set?

answer: A post-apocalyptic Earth in a dream

text: "he barren, gray landscape made me feel empty and thirsty inside, like I knew something better than this was out there somewhere. Or was it somewhere in the past?" is evidence that the setting might be post-apocalyptic.

text: "Was this the aftermath of a dispute between our territory’s leader with another?" is evidence that the setting might be post-apocalyptic.

text: "It was all a dream" is evidence that the story occurs within a dream.

answer: The story is set in an unknown location, but it seems to be a post-apocalyptic landscape.

text: Does not mention that the narrator was dreaming.

refinement: The story is set in an unknown location, but it seems to be a post-apocalyptic landscape. It is also revealed at the end of the story to have taken place within a dream.

answer: The story is set in a dream.

text: Does not describe the setting within the dream.

refinement: The story is set in a dream. Within the dream, the setting appears to be a post-apocalyptic landscape.

answer: The story is set in a dream.

text: Does not mention the setting within the dream.

refinement: The story is set in a dream. Within the dream, the setting appears to be a post-apocalyptic landscape.

question: What does the group find that the leader calls "miraculous?"

answer: The group finds a village made of gelatin-like houses.

text: "The orange and green houses looked almost gelatin-like" is evidence that the group finds a village with gelatin-like houses.

text: "“There! Over there! Something… miraculous!”. Every one of us immediately perked up at the thought and made a mad dash towards the undiscovered locale" is evidence that the locale is what they find miraculous.

text: No answer given.

refinement: The group discovers a bunch of gelatin-like houses.

answer: A large neighborhood of houses.

text: Does not mention what is significant about these houses.

refinement: A large neighborhood of gelatin-like houses.

answer: A large neighborhood, apparently made of gelatin

question: Where does the group spend the night?

answer: A small neighborhood of three houses

text: "Finally, we stopped in a small neighborhood" is evidence that they spend the night in a small neighborhood.

text: "Three houses stood there seemingly untouched by the madness of what the earth was now" is evidence that they spend the night within these three houses.

answer: The group spends the night in a mysterious village made of gelatin-like houses.

text: This is incorrect. They discover the village of gelatin-like houses after waking up.

text: Empty answer.

refinement: The group spends the night in a small village with three untouched houses.

answer: They spend the night in a small neighborhood.

text: Could describe the neighborhood further.

refinement: They spend the night in a small neighborhood containing three seemingly untouched houses.

text: "Finally, we stopped in a small neighborhood" is evidence that the group spends the night in a small neighborhood.

answer: The group spends the night in a small neighborhood of houses.

text: Could specify the significance of the houses they stay in.

refinement: The group spends the night in a small neighborhood with three seemingly untouched houses.

text: "Finally, we stopped in a small neighborhood" is evidence that the group spends the night in a small neighborhood.

question: Why does the narrator believe the group will come back to the small neighborhood?

answer: The narrator believes the group will come back to the small neighborhood because they are happy there.

text: This is not what causes him to believe they'll be coming back.

refinement: The narrator believes the group will come back to the small neighborhood because they only pack their necessities when setting out.

answer: The narrator believes the group will come back to the small neighborhood because they only packed the necessities.

text: "This time though, we carried only the necessities as if we would come back" is evidence that the fact they don't pack all of their things leads the narrator to believe they'll be returning.

answer: The narrator believes that the group will come back to the small neighborhood because it is a place of safety and happiness. The narrator also believes that the mysterious village is "miraculous" and that it is a place where people can be children again.

text: The miraculous village is the village with the gelatin-like houses, not the small neighborhood where they spend the night.

refinement: The narrator believes that the group will come back to the small neighborhood because it is a place of safety and happiness.

text: The reason the narrator believes they will come back is because of what they pack when setting out.

refinement: The narrator believes that the group will come back to the small neighborhood because they only pack the necessities when setting out.

answer: They leave most of their things there

text: "This time though, we carried only the necessities as if we would come back" is evidence that the fact they don't pack all of their things leads the narrator to believe they'll be returning.

question: Write a ~3 sentence summary.

answer: The narrator is running with a group of people, passing many abandoned houses. They stop and spend the night at a small neighborhood of three houses. The next morning, they resume running until they spot a large neighborhood, which seems to be made of gelatin.

text: This summary omits the ending of the story.

refinement: The narrator is running with a group of people, passing many abandoned houses. They stop and spend the night at a small neighborhood of three houses. The next morning, they resume running until they spot a large neighborhood, which seems to be made of gelatin. The narrator then wakes up and realizes they have been dreaming.

text: "We ran for what seemed like hours, passing abandoned houses, ransacked for their valuables" is evidence that the narrator's group passes many abandoned houses.

text: "Finally, we stopped in a small neighborhood" is evidence that they stop over at a small neighborhood.

text: "The orange and green houses looked almost gelatin-like" is evidence that the village they discover appears to be made out of gelatin.

answer: The dreamer dreams of a group of people trekking across a barren landscape, eventually coming upon a village made of gelatin-like houses. They enjoy themselves in the village before waking up.

text: Would be clearer if the "dreamer" were instead referred to as the narrator.

refinement: The narrator dreams of a group of people trekking across a barren landscape, eventually coming upon a village made of gelatin-like houses. They enjoy themselves in the village before waking up.

text: The answer does not make it clear that the narrator is among the group of people.

refinement: The narrator dreams of traveling with a group of people trekking across a barren landscape, eventually coming upon a village made of gelatin-like houses. They enjoy themselves in the village before waking up.

answer: The protagonist has a dream where they are running with a group of people. They come to a neighborhood of houses that are made of gelatin. They have a good time and forget about their past. They wake up and realize it was all a dream.

text: "I awoke in my bedroom; It was all a dream" is evidence that the story occurs within a dream.

text: "The orange and green houses looked almost gelatin-like" is evidence that they encounter houses that appear to be made of gelatin.

answer: The narrator is running with a group of people. They stop at a small neighborhood and set down their valuables. They see a large neighborhood of houses and are excited to see them.

text: Does not mention what is significant about the large neighborhood.

refinement: The narrator is running with a group of people. They stop at a small neighborhood and set down their valuables. They see a large neighborhood of houses that appear to be made of gelatin and are excited to see them.

text: The transition between the second and third sentence could be clearer.

refinement: The narrator is running with a group of people. They stop at a small neighborhood and set down their valuables. The next day, they set out and see a large neighborhood of houses that appear to be made of gelatin and are excited to see them.

text: Does not mention the twist ending.

refinement: The narrator is running with a group of people. They stop at a small neighborhood and set down their valuables. The next day, they set out and see a large neighborhood of houses that appear to be made of gelatin and are excited to see them. The narrator then wakes up and realizes they have been dreaming the entire time.


text:
    When the world was young and innocent of Death, and Light ruled while Darkness slept, my sister and I lived in a garden. In this garden there were many beautiful things: plants and creatures alike. While we loved this garden, we were not the caretakers of it and knew not who the gardener was who had planted it or who it was that took care of it; yet it was always quite luscious and constantly thriving. One day while wandering throughout the garden we decided to rest under our favorite cherry tree, which was in full blossom.

    While we rested and talked, there came a great rush of air and a tremendous beating of wings above the tree where we sat. It was a bird that landed gracefully but powerfully in front of us. But this was not just a bird, no, this was a beast of a bird, a king of winged creatures, a lord of the skies. Its colors were that of the rainbow and its feathers many and soft to the eyes. Its size was enormous and great: nearly ten feet from beak to claw and its wingspan at least that twice. We were, of course, amazed at the size and greatness of this bird. We both watched in wonder as all the birds of the garden, and all the animals too, came to this beast’s feet and offered gifts of fruit, flowers, and dance and song. All the creatures in the garden seemed to fear and worship this magnificent bird.

    Then, after seeing the respect and adoration this winged master was receiving, we grew jealous and began to hate the bird and despise it for its beauty and power. We wanted the love and worship of the animals, for we were the blessed, the human, the masters of the garden–or so we deemed. We befriended this beautiful beast and then poisoned an apple and gave it to the bird as a gift. The bird ate it eagerly. Soon the beast was crying out in pain while my sister and I danced around him and his misery.
Soon after that, the creature breathed his last. But our jealousy had grown, as it always does. I cut off his head with my sword, and my sister and I pulled off every last one of his colorful feathers and made a coat out of them. We marched and we pranced around the garden with our pride and our lust, brightly colored, while all the animals bowed to us now and gave us their wealth and their loyalty.
Before long, the sky began to weep, and the raindrops washed away the blood on our hands but not on our hearts. With the rain came the guilt of our sin, the knowledge of our transgression–the fruit of our conscience.

    For we realized then just what it was we had done. We had destroyed something beautiful, we had horrified something lovely, we had damned something blessed. The beautiful beast was now nothing more than bones which were scattered on the ground. And so we set to work in utter desperation: to try and piece the bird back together again. Yet our foolish attempt to mend that which we had broken was in vain; for we were destroyers, not creators; we were haters, not lovers; were children, not gods.
The product we created was far from the beautiful creature that once ruled the garden. This was no animal we made, it was a machine. Yes a machine: one with many whining gears and moving parts. We had destroyed beauty, and sought to recreate that which only can be created, not produced or made with human hands; it was not beauty at all.  We watched helplessly as our machine went on a rampage, cutting and burning all the trees and plants in the garden, and forcing all the animals to flee from their once-beautiful homes.

     So there we stood, my sister and I, amidst the ruin of our garden, the trees aflame, beauty destroyed, perfection mutilated: by us and our machine. We left the garden and found a cave far off where we spent the rest of our days: in darkness and not light, in horror and not beauty: in Death and not Life.

title: Something Beautiful Destroyed

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the process by which Death first entered the garden where the protagonists lived?

answer: There is no clear answer to this, but the telling of the story does appear to follow a destructive course. The animal terrorizes the "garden" and the other animals take refuge in the cave, which the author says equals darkness and horror

text: This answer is incorrect. There is no animal terrorizing the garden, and only the protagonists take shelter in the cave.

text: Blank response.

refinement: The garden where the protagonists lived used to be pure and devoid of death; until the giant bird came. The animals in the garden loved the bird, bringing it gifts and worshipping it. These acts aroused jealousy in the protagonists, so they ended up poisoning the bird, killing it.

answer: The conditions of a paradise were shattered when the paradisiacal woman and her sister, who were discontent with their place in the world, decided to poison a bird as a way of revenge. The bird many refer to is God (of Christianity) -specifically Jesus Christ, who is similarly slain by the evil doers. When the bird died, the paradisiacal garden descended into a hell and peace was lost

text: This speculation is unnecessary and too assumptive.

refinement: The conditions of a paradise were shattered when the paradisiacal woman and her sister, who were discontent with their place in the world, decided to poison a bird as a way of revenge. When the bird died, the paradisiacal garden descended into a hell and peace was lost

text: The girls poisoned the bird due to jealousy. Not revenge.

refinement: The conditions of a paradise were shattered when the paradisiacal woman and her sister, who were discontent with their place in the world, decided to poison a bird due to their jealousy. When the bird died, the paradisiacal garden descended into a hell and peace was lost

text: This isn't a part of the initial process and should be omitted.

refinement: The conditions of a paradise were shattered when the paradisiacal woman and her sister, who were discontent with their place in the world, decided to poison a bird due to their jealousy.

text: This word isn't really accurate and should be omitted.

refinement: The conditions of a paradise were shattered when a woman and her sister, who were discontent with their place in the world, decided to poison a bird due to their jealousy.

text: Specify that the poisoning is when Death entered the garden.

refinement: The conditions of a paradise were shattered and Death first entered the garden when a woman and her sister, who were discontent with their place in the world, decided to poison a bird due to their jealousy.

answer: The garden where the protagonists lived used to be pure and devoid of death; until the giant bird came. The animals in the garden loved the bird, bringing it gifts and worshipping it. These acts aroused jealousy in the protagonists who despised the bird for the attention it was getting. The protagonists ended up poisoning the bird, killing it.

answer: In jealousy, the protagonists poisoned a beautiful bird, which subsequently died. The protagonists then realized the consequences of their actions and created a mechanical creature to wreak havoc in the garden. As a result of the machines destructive rampage, the protagonists were left in darkness, guilt and horror.

text: This deals with what happens after death first enters the garden. It would be better to omit this.

refinement: In jealousy, the protagonists poisoned a beautiful bird, which subsequently died.

answer: The protagonists' jealousy of the beautiful bird ultimately led them to poison it and watch in satisfaction as it died. In turn, this led to the creation of a crude machine which destroyed everything in the garden. Death first entered the garden when the protagonists acted on their jealousy of the bird, ultimately leading to all the devastation seen.

text: This isn't a part of the process of death first entering the garden. This should be omitted.

refinement: The protagonists' jealousy of the beautiful bird ultimately led them to poison it and watch in satisfaction as it died.  Death first entered the garden when the protagonists acted on their jealousy of the bird, ultimately leading to all the devastation seen.


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He inhales and draws back the string, stares down the target, releases and exhales. An eight, the next one would need to be higher. He nocks another, inhale and draw, release and exhale. Perfect ten. He sees something out of the corner of his eye, it's her, walking down the grove. He nocks another, inhale and draw, release and exhale. Perfect ten. She is closer now, nearly at the ropes. He nocks another, inhale and draw, release and exhale. A nine, he had felt her presence. She is behind him now, but says nothing and waits for him to empty his quiver. He nocks another, inhale and draw, release and exhale. Perfect ten, he has shown improvement.

He turns to her and hangs up the bow, stares into her eyes and she stares back at him. He shows her to the gate. They sit at the table and watch as the gunmen across the road volley at their targets. They share a smile as the youngest of her clan hits a plastic Native American and rejoices. He motions to the bow. She smiles and nods. He retrieves his arrows and picks up the bow for her. Their hands touch. He gets goose bumps but holds his resolve. He moves behind her and moves her hips sideways. They felt like they belonged in his hands. He moved his arms around and guided her fingers up the string. She felt his breaths against her back. He nocked the first arrow and helped to guide back the string. He stepped back and let her loose the arrow. It hit the target solid, a four, high and to the right. They both laughed. He moved in and helped her to aim. He stepped back and the arrow was loosed. A five, still high but centered. He moved in again. She liked it when he was close. A step back. A loosed arrow. A seven, low and to the left. She turned and looked at him. He simply nodded. Nocked, inhale and draw, release and exhale. A nine, she gets excited. She nocks her last arrow, inhale and draw, release and exhale. A ten. She embraces him and he embraces her.

He hangs up the bow and takes her picture next to the target. The arrows and bow need to be put away and so they leave to the archery shed. On the short walk up they meet with a nice lady from the kitchen, she mentions what a nice couple they make. He is taken about at first but then remembers the night before. At Sea Breeze, watching the meteor shower. Their hands held together by fingers, one set strong yet nimble, the other delicate yet longsuffering. Their lips embrace. He asks her the question. She says yes.

He jerks awake. It was pleasant, yet brutal. She wasn’t the Heart mender. He still longs for her but the ship has sailed. She was the shadow of a past that will always be remembered but will never be returned to in the same light. He questions his sense of perception. He questions his understanding of himself. He doubts. He fears. He rests no more.

title: Dream of Nightmare?

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does "perfect ten" mean here?

answer: This is the score that the archer achieves with the 10th shot

text: Ten would be the score instead of the shot number.

refinement: This is the score that the archer achieves for a perfect shot

answer: The perfect ten in this passage is the perfect score on a shooting target. The character shoots 10 consecutive shots and each is a perfect 10. This symbolizes his improved skill and capability in archery since he met the woman.

text: Not every shot is a perfect 10

refinement: The perfect ten in this passage is the perfect score on a shooting target. The character shoots mostly perfect 10 shots. This symbolizes his improved skill and capability in archery since he met the woman.

answer: The perfect ten refers to the perfect score achieved by the archer when releasing an arrow that hits its target near the center.

answer: It's not stated.

text: It is not stated but it is implied that a perfect 10 is a perfect shot at a target.

refinement: It is implied that a perfect 10 is a perfect shot at a target.

answer: It likely means the woman he sees is very attractive.

text: There is no evidence that a perfect 10 is reference to the woman.

refinement: It likely means a perfect shot at a target.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What is meant by her "clan"?

answer: Her family and friends, maybe?

text: "They share a smile as the youngest of her clan hits" is evidence that it is implied that the clan might be her circle.

answer: It seems that the woman the protagonist sees is part of a group or clan.

text: "They share a smile as the youngest of her clan hits" is evidence that it is implied that the clan might be her circle.

answer: The text is not clear, but perhaps it is her Native American tribe.

text: There is no evidence to suggest that she is part of a Native American tribe.

refinement: The text is not clear, but perhaps it is her Native American tribe.

answer: The woman described in the passage is from a Native American tribe.

text: There is no evidence to suggest that she is part of a Native American tribe.

refinement: The woman described in the passage is from a Native American tribe.

answer: Not answered, possibly it is her family

text: "They share a smile as the youngest of her clan hits" is evidence that it is implied that the clan might be her circle.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why is the man taken about?

answer: It seems that he was taken about about how ready he was to answer the woman's question of what they were doing last night.

text: It fails to mention that he is taken about when the nice lady assumes he and the woman are a couple.

refinement: It seems that he was taken about about how ready he was to answer the woman's question of what they were doing last night.

answer: The man is taken about because a nice lady mentions what a nice couple they make and talks about the night before where they shared a kiss under a meteor shower. This shook the man because it is unclear to him whether or not the woman he shared a kiss with was the person who he had hoped would be his Heart mender. Because he is taken about, he questions his sense of perception and his understanding of himself.

answer: The man is taken about because the woman from the dream he had was not the Heart Mender, but instead a shadow of the past. He is confused and doubtful of his outlook on life and perception.

answer: The woman presumes they are a couple.

answer: He thought that the woman of the dream had become his partner for good.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who is the Heart mender (using the capitalization from the text)?

answer: The title of the text may refer to a composite symbol, or entity. It is not clear who is the heart mender, though the text does suggest a feminine figure that might be real or imagined. It may also refer to a chosen bride.

answer: The heart mender referenced in the text is the female archer with whom the narrator spends time practicing as well as share a kiss during a meteor shower.

text: It misses to mention that the narrator thought the woman in his dreams was the Heart mender but realizes she was not.

refinement: He thinks the heart mender referenced in the text is the female archer with whom the narrator spends time practicing as well as share a kiss during a meteor shower. However, he later wakes up and realizes she is not.

answer: He thought it was the woman in his dream, but realizes it was not.

text: "He jerks awake. It was pleasant, yet brutal. She wasn’t the Heart mender. He still longs for her" is evidence that he thought the woman in his dream was the heart mender but realizes it was not.

answer: The Heart mender is the woman who came down the rope with the archer.

text: It misses to mention that the narrator thought the woman in his dreams was the Heart mender but realizes she was not.

refinement: He thinks the Heart mender is the woman who came down the rope with the archer, but realizes she is not.

answer: She is the woman who the narrator shoots a ten with in the dream.

text: It misses to mention that the narrator thought the woman in his dreams was the Heart mender but realizes she was not.

refinement: He thinks she is the woman who the narrator shoots a ten with in the dream, but realizes she was not.

question: Write a ~3 sentence summary.

answer: A man has a dream about shooting targets with a woman he finds very attractive. They take a walk and a woman who works in the kitchen presumes they are a couple. The man wakes and realizes the woman was not the "Heart mender" after all.

answer: The man was dreaming about shooting arrows at a target and his archery instructor. He hits a target with perfect ten shots. He shoots a ten, his instructor hugs and kisses him.

text: There is no evidence to suggest the instructor hugs him after shooting a 10.

refinement: The man was dreaming about shooting arrows at a target and his archery instructor. He hits a target with perfect ten shots.

text: It misses to mention that he wakes up and the woman in his dream was not the Heart mender after all.

refinement: The man was dreaming about shooting arrows at a target and his archery instructor. He hits a target with perfect ten shots. He wakes up and realizes the woman in his dreams wasn't the Heart mender after all.

answer: The protagonist's shooting practice turns into a recollection of his failed relationship. He wakes up from a dream to realize that the shadow of the past cannot be returned to and questions his perception and understanding of himself.

text: It misses to point out that the woman in his dreams wasn't the Heart mender after all.

refinement: The protagonist's shooting practice turns into a recollection of his failed relationship. He wakes up from a dream to realize that the shadow of the past cannot be returned to and questions his perception and understanding of himself. The woman in his dreams turns out that she was not the Heart mender.

answer: The narrator paces while shooting arrows. A beautiful woman walks closer to where he stands. The narrator misses a few arrows, but hits the twnety mark on the last shot. He now takes the woman to an archery shed.

text: There's no evidence that the narrator hits a "twenty mark", he shoots perfect tens.

refinement: The narrator paces while shooting arrows. A beautiful woman walks closer to where he stands. The narrator hit his targets and marks perfect tens. He now takes the woman to an archery shed.

text: It misses to mention that the narrator wakes up and realizes that the woman of his dreams is not the Heart mender after all.

refinement: The narrator paces while shooting arrows. A beautiful woman walks closer to where he stands. The narrator hit his targets and marks perfect tens. He wakes up and realizes that the woman in his dreams is not the Heart mender after all.

answer: The main character practices archery until he sees the woman he loves walking towards the range. While shooting, he struggles to focus on the task at hand and misses his marks. The woman comes closer and they share an embrace. The next day, while sleeping, he dreams of her but realizes she is not who he's looking for. He questions his sanity and fears for the future.

text: There's no evidence of love.

refinement: The main character practices archery until he sees a beautiful woman walking towards the range. While shooting, he struggles to focus on the task at hand and misses his marks. The woman comes closer and they share an embrace. The next day, while sleeping, he dreams of her but realizes she is not who he's looking for. He questions his sanity and fears for the future.

text: Incorrectly mentions the narrator missing his marks but actually hits perfect tens.

refinement: The main character practices archery until he sees a beautiful woman walking towards the range. While shooting, he marks mostly perfect tens. The woman comes closer and they share an embrace. The next day, while sleeping, he dreams of her but realizes she is not who he's looking for. He questions his sanity and fears for the future.

text: It misses to mention that the she was a woman in his dreams who turns out to not be the Heart mender.

refinement: The main character practices archery until he sees a beautiful woman walking towards the range. While shooting, he marks mostly perfect tens and the woman comes closer as they share an embrace. The next day, the man wakes up from his dreams and realizes she is not the Heart mender after all.


text:
Democratic gubernatorial candidate Andrew Gillum has accepted invitations to two televised debates in October — one hosted by Univision 23 in Miami, the other by Leadership Florida in Davie — and the campaign said in a statement it "insists" Republican Ron DeSantis commit to another debate outside South Florida.

" Florida voters deserve the chance to hear from Mayor Gillum and Congressman DeSantis about the critical issues facing our state," senior Gillum adviser Scott Arceneaux said. "Mayor Gillum looks forward to sharing his vision for Florida that lifts people up, with higher wages, more money for schools, and affordable health care. We hope that Congressman DeSantis will join us, though it's unclear whether he'll be able to answer a single question about his non-existent campaign platform."

Asked about this today in Orlando, DeSantis told the Buzz he is "hell bent" on debating Gillum and would probably agree to more than three debates. The more they debate, DeSantis said, the better for for him.

"I definitely want to do debates. It's very, very important, particularly for a candidate like Andrew who nobody thought could win the primary. He did not face scrutiny of his record. He didn't face a single dollar in negative advertising, I don't think," DeSantis said after a picnic with Republican veterans. ". I had $17 million between U.S. Sugar and Putnam. So I think it's very important that Floridians have a clear sense of our visions for Florida, our leadership."

DeSantis and Adam Putnam held two televised debates during their Republican primary, while Gillum participated in six debates with his Democratic primary rivals and one with Florida House Speaker Richard Corcoran.

question: Where will the two debates Andrew Gillum will be in October, be hosted at?

answer: Univision 23 in Miami and Leadership Florida in Davie.

text: It needs to be specified where each debate is.

refinement: One will be hosted by Univision 23 in Miami and the other by Leadership Florida in Davie.

answer: One hosted by Univision 23 in Miami, the other by Leadership Florida in Davie.

answer: One at Univision 23 in Miami and one at Leadership Florida in Davie.

question: What's Gillum's vision of Florida in Scott Arceneaux's eyes?

answer: Arceneaux seems to suggest that Gillum's vision for Florida is one that will help people escape poverty and have great public education and health care.

text: The original text does not mention escaping poverty.

refinement: Arceneaux seems to suggest that Gillum's vision for Florida is one that will lift people up through higher wages and have great public education and health care.

text: The original text does not mention public education, only better funding.

refinement: Arceneaux seems to suggest that Gillum's vision for Florida is one that will lift people up through higher wages, have more money for schools, and health care.

text: The original text does not mention public health care, only affordable healthcare.

refinement: Arceneaux seems to suggest that Gillum's vision for Florida is one that will lift people up through higher wages, have more money for schools, and have affordable healthcare.

text: Arceneaux does not seem to suggest, he says it outright.

refinement: Arceneaux says that Gillum's vision for Florida is one that will lift people up through higher wages, have more money for schools, and have affordable healthcare.

answer: According to Arceneaux, Gillum intends to discuss "higher wages, more money for schools, and affordable health care" if he is able to debate Ron DeSantis.

text: "Intends to discuss" is not the same as having a vision.

refinement: According to Arceneaux, Gillum intends to discuss his vision of "higher wages, more money for schools, and affordable health care" if he is able to debate Ron DeSantis.

answer: A Florida that lifts people up, with higher wages, more money for schools, and affordable health care.

text: "'Mayor Gillum looks forward to sharing his vision for Florida that lifts people up, with higher wages, more money for schools, and affordable health care.'"

question: How many debates did DeSantis and Adam Putnam held?

answer: 2 debates

text: "DeSantis and Adam Putnam held two televised debates during their Republican primary."

answer: 2

text: "DeSantis and Adam Putnam held two televised debates during their Republican primary."

text: No response.

question: In how many debates did Gillum participate?

answer: 6 debates

text: This is inaccurate as Gillum participated in 7 debates.

answer: 6 debates.

text: This is inaccurate as Gillum participated in 7 debates.

answer: 6

text: This is inaccurate as Gillum participated in 7 debates.

question: Write a ~1 sentence summary.

answer: The two declared candidates for the Florida Governor's seat, Orlando-area Rep. Ron DeSantis and Tallahassee-area Mayor Andrew Gillum, exchanged barbs about debates with Univision and other organizations.

text: It's not mentioned in the text that Desantis is an Orlando-area state Rep. (Representative).

refinement: The two declared candidates for the Florida Governor's seat, Republican Ron DeSantis and Tallahassee Mayor Andrew Gillum, exchanged barbs about debates with Univision and other organizations.

text: It's not mentioned in the text that Gillum is mayor of Tallahassee.

refinement: The two declared candidates for the Florida Governor's seat, Republican Ron DeSantis and Mayor Andrew Gillum, exchanged barbs about debates with Univision and other organizations.

text: It's inaccurate to say they exchanged barbs about debates with Univision and other organizations. They exchanged barbs about each other in regards to the upcoming debates at Univision 23 and Leadership Florida.

refinement: The two declared candidates for the Florida Governor's seat, Republican Ron DeSantis and Mayor Andrew Gillum, exchanged barbs about each other in regards to the upcoming debates at Univision 23 and Leadership Florida.

text: It is omitted that Gillum is a Democrat.

refinement: The two declared candidates for the Florida Governor's seat, Republican Ron DeSantis and Democratic Mayor Andrew Gillum, exchanged barbs about each other in regards to the upcoming debates at Univision 23 and Leadership Florida.

text: It is omitted that Gillum accepted both invitations for the debates at Univision 23 and Leadership Florida.

refinement: The two declared candidates for the Florida Governor's seat, Republican Ron DeSantis and Democratic Mayor Andrew Gillum, exchanged barbs about each other in regards to upcoming debates after Gillum accepted the invitations for the debates at Univision 23 and Leadership Florida.

answer: Among Andrew Gillum's objections to participating in televised debates was that he did not face scrutiny of his record. He pushed back on this, demanding Ron DeSantis demonstrate his own stances on social issues.

text: This response is unrelated and inaccurate.

text: No response.

answer: Gillum has agreed to two televised debates, one hosted by Univision and another by Leadership Florida.

text: It is omitted that Gillum is a Democratic gubernatorial candidate for Florida.

refinement: Florida's Democratic gubernatorial candidate Gillum has agreed to two televised debates, one hosted by Univision and another by Leadership Florida.

text: It is omitted that Gillum is supposed to be debating his Republican opponent Ron Desantis.

refinement: Florida's Democratic gubernatorial candidate Gillum has agreed to two televised debates against Republican candidate Ron Desantis, one hosted by Univision and another by Leadership Florida.

text: It is omitted that Gillum is a mayor.

refinement: Florida's Democratic gubernatorial candidate Mayor Gillum has agreed to two televised debates against Republican candidate Ron Desantis, one hosted by Univision and another by Leadership Florida.

text: It is omitted that the text contains barbs the candidates make towards each other.

refinement: After Florida's Democratic gubernatorial candidate Mayor Gillum agreed to two televised debates hosted by Univision and  Leadership Florida against Republican candidate Ron Desantis, the two exchanged barbs about each other.

text: Univision should be Univision 23.

refinement: After Florida's Democratic gubernatorial candidate Mayor Gillum agreed to two televised debates hosted by Univision 23 and Leadership Florida against Republican candidate Ron Desantis, the two exchanged barbs.

answer: The text is a summary of the debates happening in Florida among the gubernatorial candidates.

text: The text is not a summary of the debates, but of Andrew Gillum's acceptance of invitations to a debate at Univision 23 and at Leadership Florida, and the resulting barbs between Gillum and his Republican opponent Ron Desantis.

refinement: The text discussed Andrew Gillum accepting invitations to debate at Univision 23 and at Leadership Florida in the Florida gubernatorial race, and the resulting barbs between Gillum and his Republican gubernatorial opponent Ron Desantis.

text: It is omitted that Gillum is a Democratic mayor.

refinement: The text discussed Democratic Mayor Andrew Gillum accepting invitations to debate at Univision 23 and at Leadership Florida in the Florida gubernatorial race, and the resulting barbs between Gillum and his Republican gubernatorial opponent Ron Desantis.

answer: Which party said they want to have a debate and which party confirmed they want to have debates?

text: The response is a question and unrelated.


text:
Jesus and Lucifer were walking around Bethlehem one day, arguing about whether to trust people or betray them, and Jesus had an idea. A way to prove he was right in this argument once and for all.

"Hey," he said with sudden clarity, "I bet you my religion would be more popular than yours."

Lucifer said nothing, but Jesus knew better and assumed.

title: Christianity

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What were Jesus and Lucifer arguing about?

answer: Jesus and Lucifer were arguing over whether to trust or betray people. Jesus proposed a bet to prove which would be more popular, his own religion or Lucifer's.

text: "Jesus proposed a bet to prove which would be more popular, his own religion or Lucifer's." - this part is unnecessary and should be deleted.

refinement: Jesus and Lucifer were arguing over whether to trust or betray people.

answer: Whether you should trust people or betray them.

text: "you should" - replace with "to"

answer: Whether to trust people or betray them.

answer: Whether to trust people or betray them

answer: They were arguing about whether to trust people or betray them.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Explain what was Jesus' idea to prove he was right.

answer: Jesus wanted to see which religion would be more popular, his or Lucifer's. He believed that if his religion was more popular, this would prove that trusting people is a better policy than betraying them.

text: "Jesus wanted to see which religion would be more popular, his or Lucifer's. He believed that if his religion was more popular, this would prove that trusting people is a better policy than betraying them." - this doesn't really answer the question. Needs a complete rewrite.

refinement: Jesus bet his religion would be more popular than Lucifer's.

answer: Jesus challenged Lucifer to bet if his religion would outlast Lucifer's religion.

text: "if his religion would outlast" - gives off the impression of which religion lasts longer. Replace with "that his religion would be more popular than"

refinement: Jesus challenged Lucifer to a bet that his religion would be more popular than Lucifer's religion.

answer: He bet his religion would be more popular than Lucifer's.

answer: Jesus wanted to bet with Lucifer on whether his religion would be more popular than Lucifer's,/

text: "Jesus wanted to bet with Lucifer" - he already made the bet. Rewrite the sentence to reflect this.

refinement: Jesus made a bet with Lucifer that his religion would be more popular than Lucifer's,/

text: "Lucifer's,/" - end the sentence properly. Remove the ,/ and use a period.

refinement: Jesus made a bet with Lucifer that his religion would be more popular than Lucifer's.

answer: Jesus' idea was to have a competition to see whose religion would become more popular. This would provide a definitive answer as to whether people should trust or betray others.

text: "This would provide a definitive answer as to whether people should trust or betray others." - this is irrelevant to the question and should be removed.

refinement: Jesus' idea was to have a competition to see whose religion would become more popular.

text: "Jesus' idea was to have a competition" - is inaccurate. Jesus proposed a bet to see whose religion would be more popular.

refinement: Jesus proposed a bet to see whose religion would become more popular.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What was Lucifer's response to Jesus' idea?

answer: Lucifer was silent.

answer: He is said to not have responded.

answer: It is not stated in the article.

text: "It is not stated in the article." - it is clearly stated: "Lucifer said nothing"

answer: Lucifer said nothing.

answer: Lucifer remained silent and presumably unconvinced by Jesus' idea.

text: "and presumably unconvinced by Jesus' idea." - this is an assumption and should be deleted.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Where were Jesus and Lucifer walking around?

answer: Around Bethlehem.

answer: In Bethlehem.

answer: Bethlehem

answer: Jesus and Lucifer were walking around Bethlehem.

answer: Bethlehem

question: Write a ~1 sentence summary.

answer: Jesus and Lucifer argue about if there's need to rely on people or trust no one and Jesus offers up a bet involving the popularity of their respective religions.

text: "need" - add "a"

refinement: Jesus and Lucifer argue about if there's a need to rely on people or trust no one and Jesus offers up a bet involving the popularity of their respective religions.

text: "a need to rely on people or trust no one" - this is inaccurate. Change to "a need to trust people or betray them"

refinement: Jesus and Lucifer argue about if there's a need to trust people or betray them and Jesus offers up a bet involving the popularity of their respective religions.

answer: In their argument, Jesus bets Lucifer that Christianity will be more popular than Lucifer's religion.

answer: Jesus and Lucifer were arguing when Jesus made a bet that his religion would be more popular than Lucifer's.

answer: Jesus says to Lucifer "I bet you my religion would be more popular than yours".

text: Rewrite the sentence to remove the quoted text and add why Jesus made the bet.

refinement: To settle an argument about whether to trust people or betray them, Jesus bets Lucifer that his religion would be more popular.

answer: Jesus had an idea to prove which religion would be more popular. He suggested a bet to Lucifer that Christianity would be more popular, and he bet that he was right.

text: Went over the 1-sentence summary requirement. Rewrite the summary.

refinement: To settle an argument with Lucifer on whether to trust people or betray them, Jesus proposes a bet that his religion would be more popular than Lucifer's.


text:
BERLIN (Reuters) - The pilots of an Air Berlin AB1.DE flight that performed a fly-past during the insolvent carrier's last long-haul flight to its hub in Duesseldorf have been suspended, the airline said on Wednesday.

When coming into land from Miami on Monday morning, the A330 jet flew low across the runway, then pulled up and banked sharply to the left before landing on its second approach.

Pilots are trained in such “go-around” procedures for aborted landings, but the manoeuvre was unusual and the German aviation authorities are investigating.

“In aviation, safety always comes first. We are taking the incident very seriously,” an Air Berlin spokesman said.

The Air Berlin pilot had requested permission from the tower to make a left turn should a go-around be necessary.

“We wanted to make a mark, a dignified and emotional goodbye,” the Air Berlin pilot was quoted as saying by German broadcaster ZDF. His identity was not given.

Another pilot for a different carrier told Reuters that a go-around should be performed only for operational or safety reasons. “Electing to do one if it is known not to be required adds an unnecessary risk,” he said.

Several videos of the incident can be viewed online. In one, control tower staff can be heard exclaiming as the plane flies past, with one person saying: “We are all in awe.”

The Air Berlin spokesman said the videos raised questions that had to be answered as part of the investigation.

Air Berlin filed for insolvency on Aug. 15 and Lufthansa LHAG.DE has signed a deal to buy large parts of its operations.

The airline will fly its final short-haul flights under the Air Berlin brand at the end of this month.

Reporting by Klaus Lauer and Victoria Bryan; Editing by Douglas Busvine and David Goodman

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question: What is being transported on the carriers?

answer: That information can't be found.

answer: Information not found.

answer: Not specified here.

question: Explain what a "go-around" is.

answer: A go-around procedure helps an airplane abort a landing. It's a procedure a pilot is trained in, and is executed when there are complications like rough weather or a malfunction in the aircraft.

text: There's no straightforward explanation of what a "go-around" is in the answer. The definition should take the place of the sentence that says go-around procedure helps.

refinement: A "go-around" procedure is when a plane makes a turn to abort the landing and make another approach. It's a procedure a pilot is trained in, and is executed when there are complications like rough weather or a malfunction in the aircraft.

text: The article doesn't specify the conditions requiring a go-around, giving the gist of it, instead.

refinement: A "go-around" procedure is when a plane makes a turn to abort the landing and make another approach. It's a procedure a pilot is trained in, and is executed for operational or safety reasons.

text: Minor grammar fix.

refinement: A "go-around" procedure is when a plane makes a turn to abort the landing and make another approach. It's a procedure a pilot is trained in and is executed for operational or safety reasons.

text: Proof for aborted landings and training: "Pilots are trained in such “go-around” procedures for aborted landings"

answer: A procedure for aborted landings in which a pilot flies a jet low across a runway but doesn't land, pulling back up instead.

text: The plane also turns during the maneuver.

refinement: A procedure for aborted landings in which a pilot flies a jet low across a runway but doesn't land, pulling back up instead to make a sharp turn.

text: The procedure is done so that a second attempt to land can be made.

refinement: A procedure for aborted landings in which a pilot flies a jet low across a runway but doesn't land, pulling back up instead to make a sharp turn for a second approach to land.

text: Not landing: "the A330 jet flew low across the runway, then pulled up and banked sharply to the left before landing on its second approach"

answer: The article says it's reserved for aborted landings, but the article doesn't mention what it is.

text: The article does talk about what a go-around is. The answer can be gathered from it.

refinement: The article says it's reserved for aborted landings. It's when a plane pulls back up to make a turn and attempt a second approach to land.

text: Aborted landing: "the A330 jet flew low across the runway, then pulled up and banked sharply to the left before landing on its second approach"

question: What is the incident being discussed?

answer: The incident in the passage is the low fly-past performed by an Air Berlin plane on its last long-haul flight. The pilots of the plane have been suspended, as the issue is investigated.

text: While the maneuver is referred to as a "fly-past", the article also elucidates it by mentioning what a go-around is. It should be in the summary instead of the fly-past.

refinement: The incident in the passage is the go-around maneuver (aborting a flight to turn around and make a second approach to land) performed by an Air Berlin plane on its last long-haul flight. The pilots of the plane have been suspended, as the issue is investigated.

text: Proof for last flight, fly-past, and suspension: "The pilots of an Air Berlin AB1.DE flight that performed a fly-past during the insolvent carrier's last long-haul flight to its hub in Duesseldorf have been suspended, the airline said on Wednesday."

answer: An aborted landing when the pilots of an Air Berlin flight performed a "go-around" maneuver in order to make a dignified and emotional goodbye for their carrier's last long-haul flight.

text: The pilots were suspended while the investigation is ongoing.

refinement: An aborted landing when the pilots of an Air Berlin flight performed a "go-around" maneuver in order to make a dignified and emotional goodbye for their carrier's last long-haul flight. The pilots have been suspended while the investigation is ongoing.

text: Proof for the maneuver: "The pilots of an Air Berlin AB1.DE flight that performed a fly-past"

text: Proof for pilot's reasoning: '“We wanted to make a mark, a dignified and emotional goodbye,” the Air Berlin pilot was quoted as saying by German broadcaster ZDF.'

answer: The incident being discussed is the pilots fly-past during the final long-haul flight for Air Berlin. Investigators are looking into why it happened.

text: While the maneuver is referred to as a "fly-past", the article also elucidates it by mentioning what a go-around is. It should be in the summary instead of the fly-past.

refinement: The incident being discussed is the pilots go-around maneuver (aborting a flight to turn around and make a second approach to land) during the final long-haul flight for Air Berlin. Investigators are looking into why it happened.

text: The pilots are suspended.

refinement: The incident being discussed is the pilots go-around maneuver (aborting a flight to turn around and make a second approach to land) during the final long-haul flight for Air Berlin. Investigators are looking into why it happened. The pilots are suspended for the time being.

text: Grammar fix for "pilot's"

refinement: The incident being discussed is the pilots' go-around maneuver (aborting a flight to turn around and make a second approach to land) during the final long-haul flight for Air Berlin. Investigators are looking into why it happened. The pilots are suspended for the time being.

text: Proof for the maneuver: "The pilots of an Air Berlin AB1.DE flight that performed a fly-past"

text: Proof for investigation: "the manoeuvre was unusual and the German aviation authorities are investigating."

question: Where did the incident take place?

answer: Germany

text: The answer is too vague. The city should be mentioned.

text: Minor grammar fix.

text: Dusseldorf is a German city. The article says "a fly-past during the insolvent carrier's last long-haul flight to its hub in Duesseldorf".

answer: Duesseldorf

text: The city is in Germany, which is a helpful thing to mention for readers who may or may not know this.

text: "a fly-past during the insolvent carrier's last long-haul flight to its hub in Duesseldorf"

answer: Germany

text: The answer is too vague. The city should be mentioned.

text: Minor grammar fix.

text: Dusseldorf is a German city. The article says "a fly-past during the insolvent carrier's last long-haul flight to its hub in Duesseldorf".

question: What is the name of the pilot involved in the incident?

answer: That information can't be found.

text: '“We wanted to make a mark, a dignified and emotional goodbye,” the Air Berlin pilot was quoted as saying by German broadcaster ZDF. His identity was not given.'

answer: The names of the pilots were not listed.

text: '“We wanted to make a mark, a dignified and emotional goodbye,” the Air Berlin pilot was quoted as saying by German broadcaster ZDF. His identity was not given.'

answer: Lufthansa LHAG.DE has signed a deal to buy large parts of its operations.

text: The answer is completely irrelevant to the question.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: Air Berlin has suspended the pilots of Flight AB1125-a Boeing A330 which made an unusual landing during its final voyage on Monday. The pilots were suspended due to an investigation regarding the fly-by-attempt landing which has been captured on multiple videos posted online.

text: The flight name isn't in the article.

refinement: Air Berlin has suspended the pilots of a Boeing A330 which made an unusual landing during its final voyage on Monday. The pilots were suspended due to an investigation regarding the fly-by-attempt landing which has been captured on multiple videos posted online.

text: The fly-by attempt should be elucidated to explain what a go-around is.

refinement: Air Berlin has suspended the pilots of a Boeing A330 which made an unusual landing during its final voyage on Monday. The pilots were suspended due to an investigation regarding the go-around maneuver (aborting a flight to turn around and make a second approach to land) which has been captured on multiple videos posted online.

text: The suspension is mentioned twice. The unique information in the first sentence should be put into the second.

refinement: The pilots of a Boeing 330 airplane were suspended by Air Berlin due to an investigation regarding the go-around maneuver (aborting a flight to turn around and make a second approach to land) which has been captured on multiple videos posted online.

text: Proof of suspension and unusual landing: "The pilots of an Air Berlin AB1.DE flight that performed a fly-past during the insolvent carrier's last long-haul flight to its hub in Duesseldorf have been suspended"

answer: Both the pilots and officers involved in the fly-past have been suspended. The Air Berlin spokesperson believes this raises questions to be seen as part of the investigation.

text: There were no officers mentioned, suspended or not.

refinement: The pilots involved in the fly-past have been suspended. The Air Berlin spokesperson believes this raises questions to be seen as part of the investigation.

text: The reason for the suspension should be adequately expressed.

refinement: The pilots involved in the fly-past have been suspended. The go-around maneuver is reserved for emergency situations. The Air Berlin spokesperson believes this raises questions to be seen as part of the investigation.

text: Air Berlin spokesperson talks about the videos captured.

refinement: The pilots involved in the fly-past have been suspended. The go-around maneuver is reserved for emergency situations. The Air Berlin spokesperson believes the videos of the event raise questions to be seen as part of the investigation.

text: The flow of writing can be better.

refinement: The pilots involved in a fly-past have been suspended for the go-around maneuver, which is reserved for emergencies. The Air Berlin spokesperson believes the videos of the event raise questions that need to be answered as part of the investigation.

text: Suspended pilots: "The pilots of an Air Berlin AB1.DE flight that performed a fly-past during the insolvent carrier's last long-haul flight to its hub in Duesseldorf have been suspended"

answer: Air Berlin's last long-haul flight is being celebrated - the A330 performed a fly-by at Duesseldorf Airport and it received worldwide media attention. Due to this much media attention, the pilots were suspended and an investigation is being performed.

text: The flight wasn't being celebrated.

refinement: Air Berlin's A330 performed a fly-by at Duesseldorf Airport and it received worldwide media attention. Due to this much media attention, the pilots were suspended and an investigation is being performed.

text: The investigation and suspension are because of the maneuver, not the media attention.

refinement: Air Berlin's A330 performed a fly-by at Duesseldorf Airport and it received worldwide media attention. Due to the go-around maneuver being reserved for emergencies, the pilots were suspended and an investigation is being performed.

text: Flow can be improved.

refinement: An Air Berlin A330 performed a fly-by at Duesseldorf Airport, and it received worldwide media attention. Due to the go-around maneuver being reserved for emergencies, the pilots were suspended, and an investigation is being performed.

answer: Two pilots have been suspended after performing a go-around maneuver when landing an Air Berlin carrier in Duesseldorf. The pilots wanted to give a showy goodbye for their carrier's last long-haul flight. The maneuver consisted of flying low across the runway and then pulling up and banking sharply left before coming on for a second landing. Such maneuvers are typically only used for safety reasons and are risky if unnecessary.

text: Proof for suspension, maneuver, and city: "The pilots of an Air Berlin AB1.DE flight that performed a fly-past during the insolvent carrier's last long-haul flight to its hub in Duesseldorf have been suspended, the airline said on Wednesday."

text: Proof for pilots' reasoning: '“We wanted to make a mark, a dignified and emotional goodbye,” the Air Berlin pilot was quoted'

text: The maneuver's explanation: "the A330 jet flew low across the runway, then pulled up and banked sharply to the left before landing on its second approach."

text: Risks: 'Another pilot for a different carrier told Reuters that a go-around should be performed only for operational or safety reasons. “Electing to do one if it is known not to be required adds an unnecessary risk,” he said.'

answer: Former German airline carrier, Air Berlin, had their last long-haul flight through Duesseldorf where they granted permission for an unusual manoeuvre. Control towers across Germany looked on as the Air Berlin A330 quickly approached the runway after takeoff before banking to the left and flying low across the runway. The pilot was quoted in a German broadcaster that he wanted to create a 'dignified and emotional goodbye' for the citizens of Berlin through the unusual maneuver.

text: The airline carrier didn't grant permission, they suspended the pilots.

refinement: Former German airline carrier, Air Berlin, had their last long-haul flight through Duesseldorf where they suspended the pilots for an unusual manoeuvre. Control towers across Germany looked on as the Air Berlin A330 quickly approached the runway after takeoff before banking to the left and flying low across the runway. The pilot was quoted in a German broadcaster that he wanted to create a 'dignified and emotional goodbye' for the citizens of Berlin through the unusual maneuver.

text: The plane's maneuver is described incorrectly.

refinement: Former German airline carrier, Air Berlin, had their last long-haul flight through Duesseldorf where they suspended the pilots for an unusual manoeuvre. Control towers across Germany looked on as the Air Berlin A330 approached the runway and pulled up before banking to the left and coming back for a second attempt. The pilot was quoted in a German broadcaster that he wanted to create a 'dignified and emotional goodbye' for the citizens of Berlin through the unusual maneuver.

text: The pilot's reasoning isn't for the citizens.

refinement: Former German airline carrier, Air Berlin, had their last long-haul flight through Duesseldorf where they suspended the pilots for an unusual manoeuvre. Control towers across Germany looked on as the Air Berlin A330 approached the runway and pulled up before banking to the left and coming back for a second attempt. The pilot was quoted in a German broadcaster that he wanted to create a 'dignified and emotional goodbye' through the unusual maneuver.

text: The flight was to Dusseldorf, not through.

refinement: Former German airline carrier, Air Berlin, had their last long-haul flight to Duesseldorf where they suspended the pilots for an unusual manoeuvre. Control towers across Germany looked on as the Air Berlin A330 approached the runway and pulled up before banking to the left and coming back for a second attempt. The pilot was quoted in a German broadcaster that he wanted to create a 'dignified and emotional goodbye' through the unusual maneuver.

text: "Maneuver" is spelled incorrectly.

refinement: Former German airline carrier, Air Berlin, had their last long-haul flight to Duesseldorf where they suspended the pilots for an unusual maneuver. Control towers across Germany looked on as the Air Berlin A330 approached the runway and pulled up before banking to the left and coming back for a second attempt. The pilot was quoted in a German broadcaster that he wanted to create a 'dignified and emotional goodbye' through the unusual maneuver.

answer: The pilot of an Air Berlin flight has been suspended after the plane performed an unusual bank during landing at Duesseldorf Airport during Air Berlin's last long-haul flight. The airline declined to identify the pilots nor say which airline they flew for.

text: The airline is identified in the answer, saying it's not is incoherent.

refinement: The pilot of an Air Berlin flight has been suspended after the plane performed an unusual bank during landing at Duesseldorf Airport during Air Berlin's last long-haul flight. The airline declined to identify the pilots.

text: The maneuver isn't described clearly.

refinement: The pilot of an Air Berlin flight has been suspended after the plane performed a go-around (aborting a flight to turn around and make a second approach to land) at Duesseldorf Airport during Air Berlin's last long-haul flight. The airline declined to identify the pilots.

text: There were "pilots", not a single one.

refinement: The pilots of an Air Berlin flight have been suspended after the plane performed a go-around (aborting a flight to turn around and make a second approach to land) at Duesseldorf Airport during Air Berlin's last long-haul flight. The airline declined to identify the pilots.

text: Proof for suspension, maneuver, and city: "The pilots of an Air Berlin AB1.DE flight that performed a fly-past during the insolvent carrier's last long-haul flight to its hub in Duesseldorf have been suspended, the airline said on Wednesday."


text:
AMAL RAMSIS () is an Egyptian filmmaker.[1] She studied directing at the International Film and Television School in Madrid.[2]

Filmography

  Year   Original title             English title                        Credits
  ------ -------------------------- ------------------------------------ ----------
  2018   _You Come From Far Away_   _You Come From Far Away_[3]          Director
  2015   _أثر الفراشة_              _The Trace of the Butterfly_[4][5]   Director
  2011   _ممنوع_                    _Forbidden_[6][7][8][9][10]          Director
  2009   _Life_                     _Life_[11]                           Director
  2005   _Solo Sueños_              _Only Dreams_[12]                    Director
  2001   _بيروت على شط البحر_       _Beirut Is on the Seaside_[13]       Director

She has also directed _Silence_ and _Plateau_.[14]

Prizes

Ramsis' _Forbidden_ has been awarded the Audience Award for the Best Feature Documentary in Drac Magic (May 2011), the Best Film in the Arab Film Festival of Rotterdam (September 2011), the Best Film for Human Rights in the Festival Internacional de Cine Invisible de Bilbao (September 2011), the Best Film in the Festival of Political Cinema realized by Women of Madrid (December 2011) and the Best Documentary Film in the Festival Internacional de Cine Pobre (April 2012);[15] it was also screened at the Millennium Film Festival and the Arab Film Festival Berlin.[16] Her _The Trace of the Butterfly_, an entirely independent film with no external funding, has received the Audience Award in Dortmund | Cologne's International Women's Film Festival and screened at the Istanbul Film Festival, the CINEQUEST Film Festival at California, Her Africa Film Festival and the IAWRT African Film Festival.[17][18][19][20]

Contributions to film festivals

Cairo International Women's Film Festival

In 2008, she founded CARAVAN OF ARAB AND LATIN AMERICAN WOMEN'S FILMS[21] () or ENTRE CINEASTAS (), which developed later into the Cairo International Women's Film Festival ().[22] It is the first festival of its kind in the Arab World.[23] Ramsis also heads the One-Minute Workshop program where she trains non-professional women in the basics of cinematography and short film directing.[24]

Dortmund | Cologne International Women's Film Festival

Ramsis served on the Rwe Film Award selection jury in 2015.[25][26]

[1] Amal Ramsis on IMDb

[2] Speaker profile

[3]

[4] The Trace of the Butterfly on IMDb

[5] Q&A with Amal Ramsis in DokuFest on The Trace of the Butterfly

[6] Forbidden, Trailer

[7] Forbidden on IMDb

[8] The documentary film-maker who chronicled the often absurd restrictions imposed on everyday life

[9] Arab Women Bring Sprig to the Screen: 'Forbidden' at the One World International Human Rights Documentary Film Festival in Prague

[10] Forbidden at the Centre de Cultura Contemporània de Barcelona

[11] Amal Ramsis - Filmography

[12] Solo Sueños on IMDb

[13] DOK Leipzig 2016 Catalogue

[14] 'Forbidden' on the Mediterranean Center for Audiovisual Communication's Website

[15] Projection of the award-winning documentary film “Forbidden”

[16] About 'Forbidden'

[17] Egyptian documentary wins Audience Award in International Women’s Film Festival Dortmund

[18] Trailer Ruhr Audience Award Announcement

[19] HER AFRICA! Film Festival Screening Schedule

[20] Bravery, Love, Fights, Laughs and Vegans

[21] City of Women - Profile

[22]

[23] Ramsis on Arab Women, CIWFF and The Trace of the Butterfly

[24] Amal Ramsis will give a workshop at the 11th Human Rights Film Festival

[25] Dortmund's International Feature Film Competition for Women Directors Announced Participants

[26] Jury Selection

title: Amal Ramsis

question: Who is Amal Ramsis?

answer: Amal Ramsis is an Egyptian filmmaker who studied directing at the International Film and Television School in Madrid.

answer: An Egyptian filmmaker.

answer: An Egyptian filmmaker

answer: Amal Ramsis is an Egyptian filmmaker who founded the Cairo International Women's Film Festival. She has also directed several award-winning films.

question: List Ramsis's filmography.

answer:
- You Come From Far Away

- The Trace of the Butterfly

- Forbidden

- Life

- Only Dreams

- Beirut Is on the Seaside

- Silence
 - Plateau

text: No given response.

refinement: You Come From Far Away, The Trace of the Butterfly, Forbidden, Life, Only Dreams, Beirut Is on the Seaside, Silence, and Plateau.

answer: Films she has worked on include: Silence and Plateau, Beirut Is on the Seaside, Only Dreams, Life Life, Forbidden, The Trace of the Butterfly, and You Come From Far Away.

text: 'Life' is repeated.

refinement: Films she has worked on include: Silence and Plateau, Beirut Is on the Seaside, Only Dreams, Life, Forbidden, The Trace of the Butterfly, and You Come From Far Away.

answer:
Amal Ramsis has directed the following films:
- _You Come From Far Away_ (2018)
- _The Trace of the Butterfly_ (2011)
- _Forbidden_ (2011)
- _Life_ (2009)
- _Solo Sueños_ (2005)

question: Name a prize Ramsis has received.

answer: The Trace of the Butterfly has been awarded the Audience Award for the Best Feature Documentary in Drac Magic (May 2011), the Best Film in the Arab Film Festival of Rotterdam (September 2011), the Best Film for Human Rights in the Festival Internacional de Cine Invisible de Bilbao (September 2011), the Best Film in the Festival of Political Cinema realized by Women of Madrid (December 2011) and the Best Documentary Film in the Festival Internacional de Cine Pobre (April 2012).

text: The response copied and pasted more than one prize from the article.

refinement: The Audience Award for the Best Film in the Arab Film Festival of Rotterdam.

answer: The Audience Award for Best Feature Documentary in Drac Magic.

answer: One prize Ramsis has received is the Audience Award for the Best Feature Documentary in Drac Magic (May 2011).

answer: The Audience Award for the Best Feature Documentary in Drac Magic, the Best Film in the Arab Film Festival of Rotterdam, the Best Film for Human Rights in the Festival Internacional de Cine Invisible de Bilbao, the Best Film in the Festival of Political Cinema realized by Women of Madrid, and the Best Documentary Film in the Festival Internacional de Cine Pobre.

text:
The question says, 'Name A prize she has won.'
She has won is the Audience Award for the Best Feature Documentary in Drac Magic in 2011.

refinement: The Audience Award for the Best Feature Documentary in Drac Magic for the movie 'Forbidden.'

question: Describe Ramsis's personal life.

answer: Ramsis is an Egyptian filmmaker who studied directing at the International Film and Television School in Madrid. She has directed several films, including _Forbidden_ and _The Trace of the Butterfly_.

answer: That information can't be found.

text: There is information in the article that makes up details of her personal life.

refinement: Amal Ramsis is an Egyptian filmmaker who studied directing at the International Film and Television School in Madrid. She founded the Cairo International Women's Film Festival in 2008 and has directed several award-winning films. Ramsis also served as a jury member for the Dortmund | Cologne International Women's Film Festival in 2015.

answer: Her personal life is not described.

text: There is information about her life and achievements that can make up the details for her personal life

refinement: Amal Ramsis is an Egyptian filmmaker who studied directing at the International Film and Television School in Madrid. She founded the Cairo International Women's Film Festival in 2008 and has directed several award-winning films. Ramsis also served as a jury member for the Dortmund | Cologne International Women's Film Festival in 2015.

answer: Amal Ramsis is a filmmaker from Egypt who studied directing at the International Film and Television School in Madrid. She founded the Cairo International Women's Film Festival, and has directed several award-winning films. Ramsis is also a member of the selection jury for the Dortmund | Cologne International Women's Film Festival.

text:
'Ramsis is also a member of the selection jury for the Dortmund | Cologne International Women's Film Festival.'
The article says she served on the jury in 2015, but the statement appears as if she's still a jury member.

refinement: Amal Ramsis is a filmmaker from Egypt who studied directing at the International Film and Television School in Madrid. She founded the Cairo International Women's Film Festival and has directed several award-winning films. Ramsis also served as a jury member for the Dortmund | Cologne International Women's Film Festival in 2015.

question: Summarize Ramsis's education.

answer: Ramsis studied directing at the International Film and Television School in Madrid.

answer: She studied directing at the International Film and Television School in Madrid.

answer: She studied directing at the International Film and Television School in Madrid.

answer: Ramsis studied directing at the International Film and Television School in Madrid. She has directed several award-winning films, including _Forbidden_ and _The Trace of the Butterfly_.

text: 'She has directed several award-winning films, including _Forbidden_ and _The Trace of the Butterfly_' is not necessary for the question.

refinement: Ramsis studied directing at the International Film and Television School in Madrid.

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: Amal Ramsis is an Egyptian filmmaker. She studied directing at the International Film and Television School in Madrid.

answer: Amal Ramsis is an Egyptian filmmaker who has directed several films. She has also directed the Cairo International Women's Film Festival.

text: 'She has also directed the Cairo International Women's Film Festival' is inaccurate. Ramsis founded the Cairo International Women's Film Festival.

refinement: Amal Ramsis is an Egyptian filmmaker who has directed several films. She also founded the Cairo International Women's Film Festival in 2008.

answer: This article concerns Amal Ramsis, an Egyptian filmmaker. The article lists various prizes she has received for her films and a list of films she has directed.

answer: Amal Ramsis is an Egyptian filmmaker who has directed several award-winning films, including _Forbidden_ and _The Trace of the Butterfly_. She founded the Cairo International Women's Film Festival, and has served on the jury for the Dortmund | Cologne International Women's Film Festival.


text:
**This is obviously not the best written piece, but I kept it unedited to preserve the story.**

English III

5-28-08

It was late May and the 2012-2013 school year was coming to an end. There were two weeks left of school. So far today everything was going fine. As students were half way through the last period they seemed restless. A tall adolescent entered the building at exactly 3:04pm. He had no backpack or any other school-related school supplies except for a big fluffy jacket. Underneath the jacket he had one automatic machine gun and two pistols.

If someone would have spotted this figure wearing a jacket in the summer they might suspect something. The staff was obviously oblivious. They also might have identified him as Jake Stevens. Even if they had tried to stop him it wouldn't have mattered. Jake had made up his mind. He circled the hallways wasting time waiting for school to let out. At 3:59pm he positioned himself at the end of a hallway. One minute later the bell rang and all the students came out of their classrooms. A boy and a girl holding hands exited the doorway to his right. Jake fired a spray of bullets at them hitting them both in the back. Screams went out through the hall almost simultaneously. Panicked students ran away from the shooter. Jake fired a continuous clip into the crowd hitting random targets. Jake heard the ringing of the fire alarm going off all throughout the school. Jake quickly reloaded as though he'd been practicing. Bodies littered the floor in front of him. He started walking slowly down the hallway. To the right he caught the glimpse of someone hurriedly entering the boy's bathroom. Jake swiftly turned and went into the bathroom. As he looked at the bottom of the stalls he noticed someone lifting their feet up. Jake stood still in front of that stall. "Dear God" is all Jake heard before he fired a burst through the door. Blood instantly started seeping onto the floor and Jake saw a body slump down to the ground. Jake left the bathroom and turned down the hall towards the library. When Jake went in to the library he viciously shot three people taking refuge behind a bookshelf to his left.
"Put the gun down and give up!"

It was the last period of the day and freshman Leroy Stevens was eager to get out of his AP physics class. Two minutes until the bell rang the class lined up at the door. Leroy found himself at the back of the line. When the bell rang students began rushing out of the door. Leroy heard screams and the sound of fireworks going off. "Some idiot is letting of fireworks in a high school?" Leroy thought to himself. The fire alarm soon followed the firework noise along with continuous screaming. "Oh great, now there is a fire. I have to check this out." Leroy exited the classroom and started heading towards the commotion. Leroy saw people falling down and blood coming out of them. Shocked, Leroy sprinted into a nearby bathroom. Leroy ran into a stall and began climbing upon the toilet. Leroy heard footsteps coming towards his stall. "Dear God" is all Leroy could say before a barrage of bullets blasted through the door and struck him in the chest. He felt his body go down, but he felt himself going upward. He looked down and saw his whole body motionless, covered in blood.

It was the middle of the day and police sergeant Jeremy Jenkins had just gotten off duty. On his way back to the station he got an unexpected call. "Reported disturbance at Jackson High. Shots fired, repeat, shots fired. All available units please assist immediately. " Jenkins was stunned and took a moment to take in what he had just heard. He flipped on his sirens and sped towards the school reaching his destination in a mere thirty seconds. Jenkins parked his cruiser in the empty street in front of the school. Jenkins hopped out and pulled out his gun. He entered the front doors and saw the shooter go into the library. He rushed towards it and heard a burst of fire go off right before he could get inside. "Put the weapon down and give up!" Jenkins shouted to the boy. The boy had an automatic machine gun in his right hand. He threw it aside and put his hands on top of his head. Before Jenkins could get to him though he pulled out a pistol from inside his jacket and fired two shots and Jenkins. Jenkins had dove behind cover before he could be harmed. Jenkins looked out of cover and saw the boy holding a gun to his temple. "Don't do it!" Jenkins yelled but he was too late. The boy pulled the trigger instantly killing him. His body fell upon a bookshelf knocking over several books.
His bloody head came to rest on one single book entitled "Dealing with teen pregnancy"

title: Junior year of High School I wrote this story about a school shooting. If something like this were to happen now I'd surely be punished, but in 2008 I got an A+ for it.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What is suspicious about the shooter even before he takes out the guns?

answer: He wears a fluffy thick jacket in the summer.

answer: The shooter enters the school without a back pack or any other school-related supplies and chooses the last period of the day to commit the shootings. Furthermore, the shooter fires randomly at targets without provocation and has a machine gun in his possession. This suggests that his intent is not to injure but to kill.

text: None of these mark him as suspicious

refinement: He wears a fluffy thick jacket in the summer.

answer: The tall adolescent had no backpack or any other school supplies. He is also wearing a big fluffy jacket in the warm summer months. The reason he needs the jacket is to hide his weapons.

text: THe backpack is not marked in the narrative as being the reason

refinement: He is wearing a big fluffy jacket in the warm summer months. The reason he needs the jacket is to hide his weapons.

answer: His jacket.

text: What kind of jacket and when is he wearing it must be added

refinement: He is wearing a big fluffy jacket in the summer.

answer: The shooter enters the school suspiciously wearing a big fluffy jacket on a hot day and he doesn't have any school supplies except for guns. He is also acting erratic and around 3:59pm he starts shooting indiscriminately.

text: This line is not necessary

refinement: The shooter enters the school suspiciously wearing a big fluffy jacket on a hot day and he doesn't have any school supplies except for guns.

text: What season is it?

refinement: The shooter enters the school suspiciously wearing a big fluffy jacket on a hot day in the summer and he doesn't have any school supplies except for guns.

text: This line is not relevant

refinement: The shooter enters the school suspiciously wearing a big fluffy jacket on a hot day in the summer.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does Leroy think is the source of the unusual noises he hears before leaving his class?

answer: Leroy heard the gunshots and screams. He thinks it is the sound of fireworks going off. When he hears the fire alarm he believes that the fireworks have caused a fire, he thinks that the screaming is a result of the fire.

answer: Leroy believes someone must be playing with fireworks inside the high school.

text: Add in the fire-alarm and screaming

refinement: Leroy believes someone must be playing with fireworks inside the high school. When he hears the fire alarm he believes that the fireworks have caused a fire, he thinks that the screaming is a result of the fire.

answer: A police officer speeding to the scene.

text: This is from a different episode in the narrative

text: This is the proper episode in the narrative where Leroy reflects on fire

refinement: Leroy believes someone must be playing with fireworks inside the high school. When he hears the fire alarm he believes that the fireworks have caused a fire, he thinks that the screaming is a result of the fire.

answer: It sounds like he believes someone is setting off firecrackers in a school.

text: It does not sound like. That is stated in the narrative

refinement: He believes someone is setting off firecrackers in a school.

text: Add in his beliefs about firecrackers

refinement: He believes someone is setting off firecrackers in a school. When he hears the fire alarm he believes that the fireworks have caused a fire, he thinks that the screaming is a result of the fire.

answer: Leroy believes the unusual noises he heard are from fireworks being set off in the school.

text: Add in his beliefs about the fire alarm

refinement: Leroy believes the unusual noises he heard are from fireworks being set off in the school. When he hears the fire alarm he believes that the fireworks have caused a fire, he thinks that the screaming is a result of the fire.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who is killed in the standoff between Jake and Jeremy Jenkins?

answer: It is not immediately clear from the story which of the two is actually killed but it is likely that the boy killed himself. Jenkins was looking out from cover which he had found so it is unlikely that Jake could be pointing the pistol at his head. Also Jenkins says "Don't do it" which doesn't sound like a plea for his own life.

text: It is clear and explicitly stated here

answer: Jake guns down Leroy Stevens after going into the library.

text: This is not from the correct episode in the story

text: This is the correct episode in the story

refinement: Jake takes his own life in the standoff.

answer: Leroy is killed by Jake Stevens.

answer: Leroy Stevens is killed by Jake Stevens in the bathroom stall.

answer: Jake kills himself