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 [Craig Shakespeare]
Craig Shakespeare has endured a tumultuous first seven months in management but has adapted impressively to the job Credit: Mike Egerton/PA

It was a Premier League game against Liverpool where it all began for Craig Shakespeare.

He won that match in February - his first as Leicester's manager - but as he prepares for a reunion with Jürgen Klopp on Saturday, even he cannot have envisaged the drama of the seven months that have passed since.

Shakespeare has endured the ultimate crash-course in management after succeeding Claudio Ranieri, a chain of events for which the best coaching manuals can never prepare anyone.

As he settled into a chair in a suite at the King Power Stadium on Friday, he is still struggling to take in the tumultuous 23 games which have flown by since Ranieri's departure.

“That first Liverpool game feels ages ago now and when you sit down and analyse everything that’s happened in that time, it can be frightening,” he says.

Ranieri and Shakespeare won the league together but it did not stop rumours from circulating last season that Shakespeare had stabbed the Italian in the back Credit: Nick Potts/PA

“We’ve had loads of things to deal with – there was me taking over from Claudio, the hardest thing I’ve had to do in my career because of the circumstances.

“People had their ideas of who the villains were and my family were hearing about me being the man who knifed Claudio in the back. It didn’t really get to me because you have to be resilient in football.

“I was still an employee of the club and I didn’t want them to be in the relegation zone. That first result [a 3-1 win] was massive for everyone but it was still nice to walk my dog the following day and return to normality.”

His 11-year-old chocolate Labrador, Alfie, must be one of the fittest dogs in Lichfield, for Shakespeare has spent much of this year striding on the parks near his home in periods of reflection.

After securing top-flight safety he was whisked away to Monte Carlo by Leicester’s owners and offered the job, but those hopes of normality disappeared over the summer.

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First, there was Riyad Mahrez, who put in a transfer request and then spent deadline day hopping around European airports in a bid to force a move.

“I was sitting at home and got a phone call from Jon [Rudkin, director of football] saying the Algerian FA had given Riyad permission to miss the game. It was a real knife-edge time and we were in the hands of other people. We understood he wanted to move because he’d made it clear but the owners wanted a realistic price.

“Dealing with that was another moment in the managerial experience. He came back to training after the window closed and we were calling him Tom Hanks out of _The Terminal_.”

And then there was Danny Drinkwater - another key member of the title-winning squad – who demanded to leave, eventually getting his wish with a £35m move to Chelsea.

It was a moment which still rankles with Shakespeare.

“Sometimes players see the opportunity to move to a bigger club and the financial rewards that might bring. Danny made it clear he wanted to move and didn’t want to be here. The relationship we’d had up to that point had been very good.

Nigel Pearson remains a strong influence on his former assistant Credit: Ross Kinnaird/Getty Images

“I’ll be honest, I wasn’t happy losing one of my best players. The big disappointment is I didn’t want to sell him for any price and ultimately I have to abide by people above me because they run the club.”

Finally, the biggest head-scratcher of all. Sporting Lisbon midfielder Adrien Silva was targeted as Drinkwater’s replacement and though a £25m fee and terms were agreed, Leicester were 14 seconds late filing paperwork. Silva, and Leicester, are still waiting for the green light from Fifa to ratify the deal.

“You can do all the courses in the world but I’ve never encountered this before. How can you call Sir Alex Ferguson, for example, and ask him about that one?

“Legally somebody might tell me I’m not allowed to talk to him but the human side says you want to find out how he’s feeling. He’s a footballer in limbo through no fault of his or mine. You want to make him feel appreciated, which is why I invited him into the dressing room to see the players on Tuesday night [after the Carabao Cup win over Liverpool].”

Despite all the turmoil, Shakespeare – or ‘Shakey’ as he is more commonly known - has adapted impressively to management after spending most of his coaching career as a No2 under Nigel Pearson and Ranieri.

His reputation on the training field is exemplary, temporarily earning him a place on Sam Allardyce’s England staff, while he is also a shrewd tactician, spooking Atlético Madrid in last season’s Champions League quarter-final by switching to three at the back at half-time.

Pearson, who returned to football on Friday by joining King Power owned OH Leuven, remains a major influence.  “Nigel has not only been a work colleague but someone I’ve grown up with during my football development. I’m really pleased to see him back in.

“We stayed together at Hull, came back here and I would say Nigel has been my biggest influence from a coaching point of view.

“He’s just a nightmare to get hold of. I must have about six phone numbers next to his name, but even then you can’t get him. He’s either walking up a mountain or somewhere with no reception.”

Shakespeare’s other influences may surprise you. He was a left-footed midfielder as a player and Tommy Coakley, his manager at Walsall in the late 1980s when the club won promotion from the old Division Two, and West Brom’s Bobby Gould figure highly.

“They both taught me a lot. With Bobby, I’ll never forget when we went to Shrewsbury on the last day of the season with 4,000 fans there. He wasn’t a popular choice and we’d had an average season. We had a pre-match meal in the hotel and he suggested we take the 10-minute walk to the stadium instead of getting on the coach.

“We got recognised quickly and the fans were carrying mock coffins with Bobby’s face on the side. I was thinking: ‘Wow, he’s got a real thick skin.’ But it was about him saying we could deal with anything. It was about team spirit and togetherness, it really stuck with me.”

Has Shakespeare changed since becoming a No1? “The job does take up a large chunk of your life. I switch off in the summer but during the season it’s difficult, I don’t want to let anyone down.

“I quite enjoy my own space at times, but I don’t want to change. As an assistant I loved being just under the radar. As a Premier League manager you can’t do that so much. But you know what? That’s part and parcel of it and if you don’t like it, don’t do it.

“The only thing that would probably surprise people is that I once got to the last 20 of the England under-16 volleyball trials.

“Win, lose or draw against Liverpool, I’ll be walking the dog on Sunday.”

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who is the subject of the article?

answer: Craig Shakespeare

text: A dot is missing at the end of the sentence.

answer: Craig Shakespeare

text: A dot is missing at the end of the sentence.

answer: The subject of the article is Craig Shakespeare.

answer: Craig Shakespeare

text: A dot is missing at the end of the sentence.

answer: The subject of the article is Craig Shakespeare.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What sport is being discussed in the article?

answer: Football

text: A dot is missing at the end of the sentence.

text: 'Pearson, who returned to football on Friday by joining King Power owned OH Leuven, remains a major influence.  “Nigel has not only been a work colleague but someone I’ve grown up with during my football development.' supports the answer.

answer: Soccer (also called football in other parts of the world).

text: 'Pearson, who returned to football on Friday by joining King Power owned OH Leuven, remains a major influence.  “Nigel has not only been a work colleague but someone I’ve grown up with during my football development.' supports the answer.

answer: Soccer

text: There is no dot at the end of the sentence.

text: 'Pearson, who returned to football on Friday by joining King Power owned OH Leuven, remains a major influence.  “Nigel has not only been a work colleague but someone I’ve grown up with during my football development.' supports the answer.

answer: Soccer

text: A dot is missing at the end of the sentence.

text: 'Pearson, who returned to football on Friday by joining King Power owned OH Leuven, remains a major influence.  “Nigel has not only been a work colleague but someone I’ve grown up with during my football development.' supports the answer.

answer: Football.

text: 'Pearson, who returned to football on Friday by joining King Power owned OH Leuven, remains a major influence.  “Nigel has not only been a work colleague but someone I’ve grown up with during my football development.' supports the answer.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does Craig Shakespeare do?

answer: Craig Shakespeare is a Premier League manager. He has endured a tumultuous first seven months in the job, leading Leicester City to safety and being faced with some challenging circumstances. These challenges include Riyad Mahrez putting in a transfer request and Danny Drinkwater requesting a move away from the club. Despite all this, Shakespeare has adapted impressively to management. One influence on him is Nigel Pearson, his former boss. Other influences include Tommy Coakley and Bobby Gould.

answer: He is the Leicester manager, succeeding Claudio Ribari.

text: 'Shakespeare has endured the ultimate crash-course in management after succeeding Claudio Ranieri' supports the answer.

answer: Craig Shakespeare is a football manager.

text: 'He won that match in February - his first as Leicester's manager' supports the answer.

answer: He's a manager.

text: 'He won that match in February - his first as Leicester's manager' supports the answer.

answer: He is a manager of Leicester.

text: 'He won that match in February - his first as Leicester's manager' supports the answer.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who do the rumors claim that Shakespeare stabbed in the back?

answer: Ranieri.

text: 'Ranieri and Shakespeare won the league together but it did not stop rumours from circulating last season that Shakespeare had stabbed the Italian in the back Credit: ' supports the answer.

answer: Claudio Ranieri

text: A dot is missing at the end of the sentence.

text: 'Ranieri and Shakespeare won the league together but it did not stop rumours from circulating last season that Shakespeare had stabbed the Italian in the back Credit: ' supports the answer.

answer: The rumors claim that Shakespeare stabbed in the back Claudio Ranieri, his manager when they won the Premier League.

text: 'Ranieri and Shakespeare won the league together but it did not stop rumours from circulating last season that Shakespeare had stabbed the Italian in the back Credit: ' supports the answer.

answer: According to the passage, the rumors circulating claim that Shakespeare stabbed Claudio Ranieri in the back.

text: 'Ranieri and Shakespeare won the league together but it did not stop rumours from circulating last season that Shakespeare had stabbed the Italian in the back Credit: ' supports the answer.

answer: Ranieri.

text: 'Ranieri and Shakespeare won the league together but it did not stop rumours from circulating last season that Shakespeare had stabbed the Italian in the back Credit: ' supports the answer.

question: Write a ~3 sentence summary.

answer: Craig Shakespeare has had a tumultuous first seven months as Leicester's manager, dealing with high-profile player transfers and transfer requests while awaiting permission for delayed transfers. He has demonstrated resilience in the face of these challenges, while also gaining respect for his work ethic and tactical acumen. He remains hopeful of securing a positive result against Liverpool this Saturday.

text: It is not stated that he remains hopeful of securing a positive result against Liverpool this Saturday..

refinement: Craig Shakespeare has had a tumultuous first seven months as Leicester's manager, dealing with high-profile player transfers and transfer requests while awaiting permission for delayed transfers. He has demonstrated resilience in the face of these challenges, while also gaining respect for his work ethic and tactical acumen. He remains hopeful of securing a positive result against Liverpool this Saturday.

text: 'Despite all the turmoil, Shakespeare – or ‘Shakey’ as he is more commonly known - has adapted impressively to management after spending most of his coaching career as a No2 under Nigel Pearson and Ranieri. His reputation on the training field is exemplary, temporarily earning him a place on Sam Allardyce’s England staff, while he is also a shrewd tactician, spooking Atlético Madrid in last season’s Champions League quarter-final by switching to three at the back at half-time.' supports that he is gaining respect for his work ethic and tactical acumen.

text: 'First, there was Riyad Mahrez, who put in a transfer request and then spent deadline day hopping around European airports in a bid to force a move. ', 'And then there was Danny Drinkwater - another key member of the title-winning squad – who demanded to leave, eventually getting his wish with a £35m move to Chelsea.', and 'Sporting Lisbon midfielder Adrien Silva was targeted as Drinkwater’s replacement and though a £25m fee and terms were agreed, Leicester were 14 seconds late filing paperwork.' support that he was dealing with high-profile player transfers and transfer requests while awaiting permission for delayed transfers.

answer: The article discusses new Leicester manager, Craig Shakespeare and his performance in the first seven months. Shakespeare was particularly rough because of previous manager Claudio Ranieri's departure. The article also discusses Shakepeare taking over Leicester City from Ranieri, and the controversies engulfing the now-popular soccer franchise.

text: This is an abstractive summary. Most of the article supports it.

answer: The article profiles Craig Shakespeare, a successful and generally well-liked Premier League manager who has recently taken charge of Leicester City. It touches on Shakespeare's predecessor, Claudio Ranieri, as well as the footballers with which Shakespeare has worked. The article discusses some of Shakespeare's controversial actions.

text: This is an abstractive summary. Most of the article supports it.

answer: Craig Shakespeare has had a tumultuous first seven months in management. After supplanting Claudio Ranieri, Shakespeare has had to deal with Riyad Mahrez forcing a move, Danny Drinkwater demanding a transfer, and a failed attempt to sign Adrien Silva. Despite these challenges, Shakespeare has adapted remarkably and remains resilient. His biggest influence is his former manager Nigel Pearson while his hobbies include playing volleyball and walking his dog.

text: It is not stated that playing volleybal is his hobby.

refinement: Craig Shakespeare has had a tumultuous first seven months in management. After supplanting Claudio Ranieri, Shakespeare has had to deal with Riyad Mahrez forcing a move, Danny Drinkwater demanding a transfer, and a failed attempt to sign Adrien Silva. Despite these challenges, Shakespeare has adapted remarkably and remains resilient. His biggest influence is his former manager Nigel Pearson while his hobby is walking his dog.

text: 'Shakespeare has endured the ultimate crash-course in management after succeeding Claudio Ranieri,' is evidence that supplanted Ranieri.

text: 'First, there was Riyad Mahrez, who put in a transfer request and then spent deadline day hopping around European airports in a bid to force a move' is evidence that he had to deal with Riyad Mahrez forcing a move.

text: 'And then there was Danny Drinkwater - another key member of the title-winning squad – who demanded to leave' is evidence that he hadd to deal with Danny Drinkwater.

text:
'Adrien Silva was targeted as Drinkwater’s replacement and though a £25m fee and terms were agreed, Leicester were 14 seconds late filing paperwork. Silva, and Leicester, are still waiting for the green light from Fifa to ratify the deal.
' is evidence for a failed attempt to sign Adrien Silva.

text: 'His 11-year-old chocolate Labrador, Alfie, must be one of the fittest dogs in Lichfield, for Shakespeare has spent much of this year striding on the parks near his home in periods of reflection.' is evidence that his hobby i walking his dog.

answer: Craig Shakespeare has done well as manager of Leicester for seven months since his first game against Liverpool. Rumors have been claiming that Shakespeare stabbed Claudio Ranieri in the back, despite them winning the league together. Shakespeare discusses his first seven months as manager, along with some of the challenges he faced.

text: 'Ranieri and Shakespeare won the league together but it did not stop rumours from circulating last season that Shakespeare had stabbed the Italian in the back Credit:' is evideence that rumors have been claiming that Shakespeare stabbed Claudio Ranieri in the back, despite them winning the league together.


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JULIE THOMPSON KLEIN is a professor and scholar in the field of Interdisciplinary Studies at Wayne State University. Klein is widely known as a pioneer in interdisciplinary education, and has consulted widely in academic and other settings in the field. In 2016, she was a speaker at the Centennial Symposium of the Association of American Colleges and Universities.[1] During her 36 years at Wayne state, her publications have been heavily cited.[2]

Publications (partial)

BOOKS:

-   -   -   -   -   -   _Interdisciplining Digital Humanities: Boundary Work in an Emerging Field._ University of Michigan Press. 2015. .

ARTICLES:

-   “Interdisciplinarity and complexity: An evolving relationship.” structure 71 (1984): 72.
-   “Blurring, cracking, and crossing: Permeation and the fracturing of discipline.” Knowledges: Historical and critical studies in disciplinarity (1993): 185-214.
-   “Prospects for transdisciplinarity.” Futures 36.4 (2004): 515-526.
-   “Integrative learning and interdisciplinary studies.” Peer Review 7, no. 4 (2005): 8-10.
-   “A platform for a shared discourse of interdisciplinary education.” JSSE-Journal of Social Science Education 5, no. 4 (2006).
-   “Afterword: the emergent literature on interdisciplinary and transdisciplinary research evaluation.” Research Evaluation 15, no. 1 (2006): 75-80.
-   “Evaluation of interdisciplinary and transdisciplinary research: a literature review.” American Journal of Preventive Medicine 35, no. 2 (2008): S116-S123.

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[2]

title: Julie Thompson Klein

question: When was Klein hired?

answer: Klein was hired in 1976.

text: The information isn't stated.

answer: That information can't be found.

answer: Klein was hired in 1984.

text: The information isn't stated.

answer: There is not sufficient information to answer.

question: How many articles has Klein written?

answer: Klein has written 8 articles.

text: According to the article, Klein has written seven articles.

answer: There are six articles written by Julie Thompson Klein.

text: According to the article, Klein has written seven articles.

refinement: There are seven articles written by Julie Thompson Klein.

answer: Klein has written six articles.

text: According to the article, Klein has written seven articles.

answer: Seven

question: What is the most common topic Klein writes about?

answer: Interdisciplinary studies.

answer: Based on the information in the passage, it appears that Klein's most common topic is interdisciplinary education.

answer: Interdisciplinary studies

answer: Klein is a professor and scholar in the field of Interdisciplinary Studies at Wayne State University.

question: How many articles did Klein publish in 2006?

answer: Klein published two articles in 2006.

answer: There are six articles listed in the passage, all of which were published in 2006.

text: Only two articles were published in 2006.

answer: Klein published six articles in 2006.

text: Only two articles were published in 2006.

answer: Two

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: This article introduces American scholar Julia Thomas Klein. It discusses her positions, publications, and her research focus.

text: The summary should be more specific about Klein's focus as a scholar.

refinement: This article introduces American scholar Julia Thomas Klein. It discusses her positions, publications, and her research focus as a pioneer in interdisciplinary education.

answer: Julie Thompson Klein is a professor and scholar in the field of Interdisciplinary Studies at Wayne State University. She is widely known as a pioneer in interdisciplinary education, and has consulted widely in academic and other settings in the field.

answer: Julie Thompson Klein is a professor and scholar in the field of Interdisciplinary Studies, and is widely known as a pioneer in the field. Her publications have been heavily cited, and she has consulted widely on the topic.

answer: Julie Thompson Klein is a professor and scholar in the field of Interdisciplinary Studies at Wayne State University. Klein is widely known as a pioneer in interdisciplinary education, and has consulted widely in academic and other settings in the field. In 2016, she was a speaker at the Centennial Symposium of the Association of American Colleges and Universities.


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I’m sitting in the second-to-last row of the school bus, looking for someone to notice how quiet I’m being.
I’ve had a lot of days like these recently. The headache starts around noon, and by the time I get on the bus, my head is pounding and I feel like I’m going to be sick. I never do, but I kind of wish I would.
So every time, I’m stuck. Sitting here. I can’t do anything because it hurts. Doing nothing hurts too. The stringy brown leather of the seats is hot and I hate it.

I’m supposed to want everyone to be quiet. Anyway, my head stings when they’re loud. So when they start yelling too much I glare at them. They feel bad and look away. It doesn’t help.
The first few times they feel bad for you. They try to talk to you and ask you what’s wrong and how it feels and what they should do. But too many times and it’s not interesting.

I turn around behind me where the only other 5th grader is talking loudly, proud that he’s gotten the back seat. Just for today, I think. Every day we race for the back seat. I know it doesn’t seem important but it is. On days like this, though, I walk. I walked slowly here instead of the usual sprinting and shoving, and he still thinks he’s won something. Well today doesn’t count.

Finally I find myself wandering off the bus and exaggeratedly stumbling across the street. The bus rolls away with an aching hiss and I’m just standing there. I don’t want to walk home, but I can’t think of anything better. I walk a few steps and sit down. Everything is spinning and I’m really wishing I could cry. Suddenly there’s a familiar yapping. It should be annoying, but I’m so glad for the distraction that I sit and soak it in for a while before looking. I knew what it was but I looked anyway. I shouldn’t have. It’s bright out. Oh yeah, so the yapping belongs to a neighbor’s dog. There he is.

We talk about this neighbor a lot. Today he’s wearing a floral pink dress and red high heels that he’s clearly just mowed the lawn in. Oh wait, I said he. Maybe I should have said she? I don’t care. My head hurts.
He’s still just sitting there on his porch, just like every day. Well except some days. Some days he’s not there. I think I should be creeped about. I pretend to play with the grass because I still can’t get up. He’s might be looking at me. I wonder what he’s thinking. I wonder if he gets headaches too.

My migraine drops intensity for a few seconds and I need to take advantage of it. I jump up and pretend I’m fine. I walk forward, faster and faster. I make it past two houses until it all comes back, even worse to make up for the time I had.  I plop down on the curb.

Now he’s behind me, the only person outside on the whole street. I force myself to shift on the curb just enough so I can look at him, but pretend not to. Suddenly I realize how stupid I must look, and feel like I need an excuse. Dang it, if only I could cry. Instead I guess I’ll have to smile. I actually manage a sincere grin, sort of like I’m laughing at myself. I pretend he smiles back and maybe even gives me a nod, but I’m too far away and the street is blurry.

It’s time to go. I take a few deep breaths until I get one right, and then I stand up. I’m dizzy but I walk until I reach my front door. No one’s home. I walk in, collapse on the couch, and cry.

title: I'm new here, I've never written a short story in my life, and I'm really nervous. I'm sure this is awful, but could you give me some honest feedback?

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What is the narrator suffering from?

answer: From severe headaches and migraines.

answer: Migraine.

answer: The narrator is suffering from a migraine.

answer: The narrator appears to be suffering from a migraine headache.

answer: Their pain is indicative of a migraine.

text: Unnecessary use of plural - their.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who is wearing a floral pink dress and red high heels?

answer: The narrator's neighbor mowing the lawn.

text: It is incorrectly stated that the neighbor is mowing the lawn.

refinement: The narrator's neighbor, sitting on the porch.

answer: The neighbor is wearing a floral pink dress and red high heels.

answer: The neighbor, who may be a trans person.

text: There is no evidence to support that the neighbor may be trans.

answer: The neighbor is wearing a floral pink dress and red high heels.

answer: a neighbor; the narrator is a 5th grader

text: " the narrator is a 5th grader" this information is unrelated to the question, hence can be omitted.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Explain why the narrator plops down on the curb.

answer: The narrator's migraine had dropped in intensity but then gets worse forcing him to sit.

answer: The narrator's headache gets worse.

answer: The narrator plops down on the curb because they have a headache and can't keep walking. They are also frustrated and lonely, and they see a neighbor across the street and decide they are glad for the distraction. They are curious about the neighbor, but at the same time are embarrassed about how they must look trying to escape their own pain. Ultimately, the pain of the headache becomes too much, and they decide they will have to sit down and wait for it to pass.

text: Unnecessary use of the plural - they.

refinement: The narrator plops down on the curb because he has a headache and can't keep walking. He is also frustrated and lonely, and he sees a neighbor across the street and decides he is glad for the distraction. He is curious about the neighbor, but at the same time is embarrassed about how he must look trying to escape his own pain. Ultimately, the pain of the headache becomes too much, and he decides he will have to sit down and wait for it to pass.

answer: The narrator plops down on the curb because of a migraine that makes the noise of the neighborhood too painful to bear. He feels dizzy and frustrated, and the sound of the neighbor's dog yapping is a welcome distraction. He feels humiliated and self-conscious about his position but he forces himself to look at the neighbor and smile anyway. Despite being too far away to actually see the neighbor's reaction, the narrator continues to walk home.

text: This answer is not related.

refinement: The narrator plops down on the curb because his headache gets worse.

answer: They feel physically ill.

text: It is omitted that the narrator had a severe headache.

refinement: They feel physically ill. His headache got worse and he has to immediately sit.

text: Unnecessary use of the plural - they.

refinement: He feels physically ill. His headache got worse and he has to immediately sit.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What causes the 5th grader to feel proud?

answer: That day, he got the last available back seat on that school bus. Normally, they race for it on bus.

answer: The 5th grader feels proud when he's able to get the back seat on the bus, even on days when he has a migraine. His head hurts a lot, so he wants quiet on the bus so he doesn't have to suffer any more than necessary. The fact that he can claim the back seat each day is a sort of accomplishment for him.

text: It is incorrectly implied that the 5th grader who claims the back seat is the narrator.

refinement: The 5th grader feels proud when he's able to get the back seat on the bus. His head hurts a lot, so he wants quiet on the bus so he doesn't have to suffer any more than necessary. The fact that he can claim the back seat each day is a sort of accomplishment for him.

text: "His head hurts a lot, so he wants quiet on the bus so he doesn't have to suffer any more than necessary." This information is not related to the question, hence can be omitted.

refinement: The 5th grader feels proud when he's able to get the back seat on the bus. The fact that he can claim the back seat each day is a sort of accomplishment for him.

answer: That he has won the race to the back seat of the bus.

answer: The 5th grader feels proud because he won the race for the back seat on the school bus. On days when the 5th grader has a migraine, however, this is less important. The migraine causes the 5th grader to suffer through school bus rides, and the headache prevents him from participating at any level. On days when the migraine comes back, the 5th grader escapes by walking off the bus and interacting with a neighbor who is wearing a pink and red dress. The 5th grader clearly feels proud of this interaction despite the migraine.

text: It is incorrectly stated that the 5th grader who feels proud is the narrator.

refinement: The 5th grader feels proud because he won the race for the back seat on the school bus. On days when the migraine comes back, the 5th grader escapes by walking off the bus and interacting with a neighbor who is wearing a pink and red dress. The 5th grader clearly feels proud of this interaction despite the migraine.

text: "On days when the migraine comes back, the 5th grader escapes by walking off the bus and interacting with a neighbor who is wearing a pink and red dress. The 5th grader clearly feels proud of this interaction despite the migraine." This is unrelated to the question, hence can be omitted.

refinement: The 5th grader feels proud because he won the race for the back seat on the school bus.

answer: He thinks his back-seat competition has earned him something.

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: The narrator is on their way home from school and has a headache. They arrive at home with a migraine.

text: "My head is pounding and I feel like I’m going to be sick." This is evidence that the narrator has a headache.

answer: The author's first short story is about a boy who suffers from a migraine as he takes the school bus home. He attempts to walk the last stretch home but the headaches get so severe that it causes him to sit.

text: There is no evidence that the narrator is a boy.

refinement: The author's first short story is about a child who suffers from a migraine as he/she takes the school bus home. The character attempts to walk the last stretch home but the headaches get so severe that it causes him/her to sit.

text: "I’m sitting in the second-to-last row of the school bus." This is evidence that the narrator is taking a school bus.

text: "I make it past two houses until it all comes back, even worse to make up for the time I had. I plop down on the curb." This is evidence that the headache gets so severe that the child sits.

answer: This short narrative explores the feelings and experiences of an 11-year-old girl suffering from migraines. She desperately wants attention on days when she feels terrible, but gets less than she desires due to annoyance with the noise of the bus. One day, she encounters a neighbor in an unusual outfit. Despite the pain in her head, she manages a smile and gingerly walks home. She ends up alone in her house, crying from her headaches.

text: There is no evidence that the character is an 11-year-old girl

refinement: This short narrative explores the feelings and experiences of a child suffering from migraines. She/he desperately wants attention on days when she/he feels terrible, but gets less than she/he desires due to annoyance with the noise of the bus. One day, she/he encounters a neighbor in an unusual outfit. Despite the pain in her/his head, she/he manages a smile and gingerly walks home. She/he ends up alone in her/his house, crying from her/his headaches.

text: "She desperately wants attention on days when she feels terrible, but gets less than she desires due to annoyance with the noise of the bus. One day, she encounters a neighbor in an unusual outfit." This can be omitted.

refinement: This short narrative explores the feelings and experiences of a child suffering from migraines. Despite the pain in his/her head, the child manages a smile at the unusually dressed neighbor and gingerly walks home and cries.

text: "No one’s home. I walk in, collapse on the couch, and cry." This is evidence that the character is alone at home.

answer: A fifth grader without a name suffers from migraines on the bus for coming home. It makes her anxious and upset.

text: "on the bus for coming home." is grammatically incorrect.

refinement: A fifth grader without a name suffers from migraines on the bus while coming home. It makes her anxious and upset.

text: There is no evidence that the child is a girl.

refinement: A fifth-grader without a name suffers from migraines on the bus while coming home. It makes the child anxious and upset.

answer: The main character is stuck on the school bus with a migraine. A neighbor wearing a floral dress and red high heels catches the character's eye and they realize how lonely they are. Afterwards the character walks home, crying all the way, feeling both dizzy and defeated.

text: It is incorrectly stated that the character cries on the way home.

refinement: The main character is stuck on the school bus with a migraine. A neighbor wearing a floral dress and red high heels catches the character's eye and they realize how lonely they are. Afterwards the character walks home, feeling both dizzy and defeated.


text:
I am a first time poster here and unsure if this sub frowns on linking to my own site. A heads up would be nice. In the mean time. Here is a story I wrote in 2008 about socks. It has been denied publication after sitting in slush piles 10 or 12 times. My website is [joerdie.com](www.joerdie.com). The first half is below, the second is the first post as the story is over 10k. Thanks!

I looked down to see two drops of blood on the green carpet. They had come from my nose, and there would be more. The clerk, a woman in her 40's, began walking toward me from the counter with a concerned look on her face. It occurred to me that she may find it odd that I was standing in the sock aisle, with a nose bleed, after closing time, at a Boy Scout Store.

My love affair with the Boy Scout sock started innocently enough. I had graduated from Cub Scouts into Boy Scouts in the fall of 1990, around the time I turned ten. Reading about the BSA (Boy Scouts of America) now, I can only imagine the amount of angst within its ranks. The membership controversies over sexual abuse, homosexuality, and religion make me wonder if I will let my son join. But my time with the Scouts was nothing but sunny skies and clean, safe times. Well, mostly anyway. There was that one summer camp when my patrol leader ran out of cigarettes and gave us all tea leaves wrapped in parchment paper saying, "Look, it's the same thing, okay?" Or the time that we filled another Scout's bellybutton with tooth paste the first night of a trip. A week later, we watched in horror as the same scout took off his shirt before jumping in the pool. The once green and white toothpaste had turned black and molded into the folds of his overweight... folds. Or the time that we wiped an entire can of catfish bait under another scout's tent at the National Jamboree. The poor kid smelled like a cow pasture for the rest of the week. Even at my wedding a Boy Scout story was told, about earning my wilderness survival merit badge when my best man and I rolled over one another down a hill because we decided to sleep on too sharp an incline. (Many in my family already thought that I may be gay. The story of two boys rolling over one another down a hill didn?t help.) The Boy Scouts was a great experience for me, filled with excitement and adventure.

I earned the rank of Life before dropping out and clearly remember the night that I told my scoutmaster I was leaving the troop. I cried and stuttered. I knew I was never going to make Eagle. It wasn't in me. I had been drifting away from Troop 674 for a year. It was my time to leave. I grew out of my uniform. I left the dreams of Eagle behind me. I even started growing my hair to lengths the Beatles would never have gotten away with. But I never took off those socks. When I started with the Scouts, the uniform sock was worn up to the knee, puce green, and had a three-inch red rim that was meant to be folded over. A uniform change in the early 1990's brought the red trim to a logical half inch. That sock was the one I fell in love with. It was called "The Boy Scout Crew Sock," but was changed later to, "Boy Scout Thorlo Hiking Sock." The sturdy socks were made from a blend of acrylic, nylon, and spandex. If you bought them from an official Boy Scout store they were treated with Triclosan, an antibacterial, antifungal agent that stopped odors and athlete's foot dead in its tracks. The sock wicked sweat away from the foot and into the shoe. You could hike all day without an extra pair and never give it a second thought. You never had to wear two pairs to stop blisters. These socks were thick and clung to your foot with the force of super glue. They were, by far, the best sock ever produced.

I haven't worn another sock since their release. I wore them to job interviews, funerals, and of course, hiking. I wore them on my first date, wedding, and to the birth of my child. Every year, my mother bought a few more pairs at Christmas, and I waited until they were beyond threadbare to throw them away. I gave serious thought to learning how to darn socks just to make old pairs new. Ask anyone who knows me well about my clothing. Invariably, my socks will come up. But I never learned how to darn socks. I never savored the pairs I owned. Standing in that aisle at the back of the Boy Scout Store, I came to the realization that my sock was not there. After eighteen years, the uniform had changed, and left me in the cold.

That's when my nose started to bleed. I was tempted to bolt to my car at the speed of shame, my embarrassment following a few seconds behind. I pictured myself in the car, nursing my nose with an old Wendy's napkin from the glove box for almost a minute before a knock on the window would catch up with me. That's when I saw the woman with the concerned look walking toward me.

title: Short Story: Memories, Blood, and Socks.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about the narrator's sentimental attachment to Boy Scout socks?

answer: Ever since their release when the narrator has worn it for jobs, funerals, and in various situations. He even wore it on his very first date. When the socks ran too thin, he'd throw them away as he had nowhere to find them again.

text: The answer could mention that his mother buys him pairs every year.

refinement: Ever since their release when the narrator has worn it for jobs, funerals, and in various situations. He even wore it on his very first date. When the socks ran too thin, he'd throw them away as he had nowhere to find them again. Every year at Christmas his mother buys him a few more pairs.

text: The phrasing of the line about throwing them away should make his reluctance clear.

refinement: Ever since their release when the narrator has worn it for jobs, funerals, and in various situations. He even wore it on his very first date. He waits until the socks are beyond threadbare to throw them away. Every year at Christmas his mother buys him a few more pairs.

text: The answer should mention his willingness to learn how to darn socks.

refinement: Ever since their release when the narrator has worn it for jobs, funerals, and in various situations. He even wore it on his very first date. He waits until the socks are beyond threadbare to throw them away. Every year at Christmas his mother buys him a few more pairs. He even considers learning how to darn socks in order to make his old pairs new.

text: "it" should be "them".

refinement: Ever since their release the narrator has worn them for jobs, funerals, and in various situations. He even wore it on his very first date. He waits until the socks are beyond threadbare to throw them away. Every year at Christmas his mother buys him a few more pairs. He even considers learning how to darn socks in order to make his old pairs new.

answer: When the narrator was eight years old, he turned into a Boy Scout.His favorite Boy Scout socks include puce green, three-inch red rim, Boy Scout Crew Sock, The saggy socks were thick and clung to feet. He loved wearing The Boy Scout Socks. He would wear the socks home and to funerals and birth of his child and boy family. He even brought the socks on his first date with his wife. The socks made his life soar like other days. As the narrator matured, he fluctuated from wearing sock to wearing stockings. Sadly, Puce green, three-inch red rim Boy Scout Crew Sock was out of stock. Out of shock that his favorite socks were out of stock, the narrator's nose bleed.

text: The answer includes irrelevant details.

refinement: His favorite Boy Scout socks include puce green, three-inch red rim, Boy Scout Crew Sock, The saggy socks were thick and clung to feet. He loved wearing The Boy Scout Socks. He would wear the socks home and to funerals and birth of his child and boy family. He even brought the socks on his first date with his wife. The socks made his life soar like other days. As the narrator matured, he fluctuated from wearing sock to wearing stockings.

text: The answer contains unattested details.

refinement: His favorite Boy Scout socks include puce green, three-inch red rim, Boy Scout Crew Sock, The saggy socks were thick and clung to feet. He loved wearing The Boy Scout Socks. He would wear the socks home and to funerals and birth of his child and boy family. He even brought the socks on his first date with his wife.

text: The answer should mention his mother.

refinement: His favorite Boy Scout socks include puce green, three-inch red rim, Boy Scout Crew Sock, The saggy socks were thick and clung to feet. He loved wearing The Boy Scout Socks. He would wear the socks home and to funerals and birth of his child and boy family. He even brought the socks on his first date with his wife. Every year at Christmas, his mother would buy him a few more pairs of the socks, and he'd wait until they were beyond threadbare to throw them away.

text: The answer should mention his willingness to learn darning.

refinement: His favorite Boy Scout socks include puce green, three-inch red rim, Boy Scout Crew Sock, The saggy socks were thick and clung to feet. He loved wearing The Boy Scout Socks. He would wear the socks home and to funerals and birth of his child and boy family. He even brought the socks on his first date with his wife. Every year at Christmas, his mother would buy him a few more pairs of the socks, and he'd wait until they were beyond threadbare to throw them away. He even considers learning how to darn socks to make his old pairs new again.

answer: The narrator's sentimental attachment to Boy Scout socks is deep and long-lasting. The narrator considers them the best socks ever produced, even though they were replaced by a newer model. The narrator carries around old pairs for a long time before finally getting rid of them, and when the socks began to change the narrator's entire world felt shaken up. The author's affection for his favorite socks goes beyond necessity or function - these socks are more than just socks; they represent stability on a personal and emotional level.

answer: When the narrator was a young boy recruited into the Boy Scouts, he was very fond of Boy Scout socks, otherwise called Boy Scout Thorlo Hiking Sock. The socks were made from comfortable material treated with Triclosan, and they made him remember the exciting times he had being a Boy Scout. His fun memories include filling a scout member's belly button with toothpaste which later got rotten, emptying a can of catfish bait under the tent of a fellow scout member, causing him to smell like cow pastures, and the time their patrol leader gave them tea leaves wrapped in parchment paper when he ran out of cigarettes. As a grown-up, he always wore those socks to every occasion in his life. He never failed to bring up his socks in any conversation, which explains how much the socks meant to him.

answer: The story suggests that the narrator had a deep and sentimental attachment to Boy Scout socks because they were a tangible artifact of their past happiness in the Scouts. The narrator considered the socks to be their love affair with the Boy Scouts and became upset when other changes in uniform led to their discontinuation. The narrator's nosebleed in the sock aisle of a Boy Scout store only compounded the grief at their realization that the favorite socks were no longer manufactured.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about the assumptions of Boy Scout activities and homosexuality?

answer: The story reflects that assumptions of Boy Scouts are mostly wholesome and innocent, including activities and sexuality. The homosexuality reference suggests that even though the Boy Scouts had controversies surrounding sexuality, many see it as an innocent organization with only a few dark stains on its reputation.

text: This answer is unattested.

text: The answer should mention the narrator's thoughts about letting his son join.

refinement: Membership controversies, including some involving homosexuality, make the narrator wonder whether he'll let his son join.

text: The answer should mention the rolling down the hill incident.

refinement: Membership controversies, including some involving homosexuality, make the narrator wonder whether he'll let his son join. The narrator's family thinks he's gay, especially when he tells a story at his wedding about rolling down a hill with one of his Boy Scout friends.

answer: Over time, the Boy Scout organization changed. With the narrator's research about the Boy Scouts of America, he found that general membership controversies regarding homosexuality and sexual abuse in camps are a cause for concern for any parent. At a point, the narrator recollected how his family members presumed he was gay when he was a Boy Scout. Even at his wedding, his best man told the story of how they both rolled over each other over a hill one time in camp, which seemed to aggravate his family's suspicions further. What seemed like childish activities indicated homosexual tendencies, even though the possibilities are not entirely ruled out in any Boy Scout camp.

text: There is unnecessary verbage.

refinement: With the narrator's research about the Boy Scouts of America, he found that general membership controversies regarding homosexuality and sexual abuse in camps are a cause for concern for any parent. At a point, the narrator recollected how his family members presumed he was gay when he was a Boy Scout. Even at his wedding, his best man told the story of how they both rolled over each other over a hill one time in camp, which seemed to aggravate his family's suspicions further.

answer: The story speaks to assumptions regarding Boy Scout activities and homosexuality. Specifically, it appears the author sees the Scouts as a safe, clean, and adventurous environment for youths. Additionally, though the author views the Boy Scout uniform as less appealing, he is nonetheless disillusioned by their newfound change. The implication is that the assumptions of Boy Scout activities are homogenous and do not include acceptance of homosexuality.

answer: The narrator behaved spontaneously during his time in Boy Scouts, and he considers the behaviors to be immature and embarrassing in retrospect. At the time, the author's actions allowed for assumptions about his sexuality, and this became another reason for his shame. Apparently, the narrator considered Boy Scout activities mildly eccentric, and Boy Scouts made the narrator feel embarrassed regardless of whether the Boy Scout trips and the joint teasing happened properly.

answer: According to the story, Boy Scout activities can be homophobic. The narrator got married with his best man said that several people in their family thought the narrator might be gay. The narrator did not think so as he never thought of himself as anything but straight. However, his complexion during the wedding might have implied differently as he had pale skin with clammy hands (a symptom of nervousness). Been said that one of the rituals of the Boy Scout is to pass thrash around a campfire, which has a homoerotic reference that confirms people's assumptions about homosexuality. The narrator smelled of alcohol and probably talked about his camp experiences - both a sign of promiscuity or homosexuality.


text:
The fan moves back and forth. Looking left then right, guarding my room from the things I cannot see. The constant whirr is calming, and reassuring to my restless mind. That is what they tell me anyway. I am restless. I am confused. I am dangerous they say. So I stay in this room, because it is what is good for me. For everyone. But I don’t mind. There’s a very nice bed, and my fan. The whirr is very calming to my restless mind, I’m told.

The people here are very kind, and come to see me often. There is a child down the hall from me that is not very pleasant though. I know all the things she has done. She’s probably sitting in there planning her next act as I speak. That’s why she doesn’t get a nice room like the rest of us. Hers is darker, and there isn’t even a window. I don’t think she’s allowed visitors anymore either. The poor child.

My family, they come to see me every week. Twice a week if I am lucky. They did anyway. Not so often anymore. I always enjoyed when my mother came though. She is most beautiful. At least she was, until one day – Oh, three years ago sounds about right. I’m sorry, I just can’t keep track of time very well in this, ever so nice room. It really is very nice. Anyway, where was I? Oh, my mother! Yes!  We found her at the bottom of the stairs. Her curly, flowing blonde hair, blood streaked, casting an almost beautiful veil of sorts over her face.

“A quick blow to the head”, they said.  “There was no sign of resistance, or struggle.” And she was gone down the spiral staircase, just like that. My mother never liked that staircase.

Personal belongings falling from her bag left a trail to her body. Almost as if it were a child’s game, with a twist at the end. The killer meant for us to find her like that. I know. But no one believes me though. They all just think I’m crazy. I know it was no accident, or fluke. Lipstick and mints don’t fall in such a perfectly crafted line like by chance! This was the work of a killer. A good one at that. Leaves no evidence, but the crime in plain sight for all to find. Almost flaunting it. Proud of it even.

I’ve watched the girl leave and return unnoticed three times. Each time claiming another victim. The nice people think she is getting better, I hear them talking about letting her have a nice room soon, and maybe even letting her go. But I know! The girl does not get better in the mind she gets better at hiding the evil keeping her here! They know nothing.

When the girl left, she used a window in one of the empty rooms. We are on the first floor, so it was probably quite easy for her. It was quiet, but not so quiet that she could be heard easily, especially with the fans whirring as they so often do. She was back within the hour and ever so graciously strolled back into her room as if nothing more than a quick run to the store had just happened. Although unsuspected by others, I knew better. My thoughts were proven correct by afternoon the next day.

I was allowed out for good behavior, and improvements with my “instability” and “franticness” as the nice people call it. Consequently, I went to visit my family. That’s when we found my mother. Her beautiful blonde hair, an elegant mess over her face. Her motionless body. The trail. They crying. They betrayal. My father and sisters seldom spoke to me, or each other for nearly a year after that.

Until the girl left again.

She was barley noticeable this night, and if I hadn’t known better I would have thought it Max, our house cat, out for a midnight stroll as he so often does. Probably admiring the very nice rooms. They are painted a beautiful shade of blue. The girl does not get to enjoy this though because she does these terrible things. Slipping out the door was a simple task for her on this night. Especially when the nice people were starting to ease up on her security and restrictions. She might have been able to have a nice room soon too.

I was also trusted more. And with each passing day I found more interesting things to do with my time. One day I simply wandered about, admiring and counting all the doors and windows I could find. They are all quite beautifully made. Carved wood frames, and shiny copper hinges around every corner, all accented by lovely blue walls. I even attended Sunday services every once and a while. These were almost as calming to me as the whirr of my fan.

I went to service that morning after the girl had left, to get my mind settled and well rested. Since I was out, I did not hear the news until nearly mealtime. My father was dead, my sister told me. In synch as they always were. Its quite a spectacle to hear them speak, it truly is. I miss their voices sometimes. It was as if they were not two minds, but one. Each knowing exactly what the other’s intentions would be. Sometimes I wished I had a twin. No one ever understood me the way they seemed to understand each other.

My father was drowned in our pool. Oh, how I loved that pool. Summers of swimming and carefree fun. He never went near it though. Not once. He was always afraid of water, but had it made just for us. That’s how we knew it wasn’t an accident.
I was allowed out for the funeral.

After that I did not see the girl for a long time, and my sisters started coming to visit every week. Over the course of their visits however, they acquired a distaste for my fan, which I would never fully understand. When they were here, we spoke of the past, new events, but mostly of when I would be able to leave. It was always a topic of interest that no one seemed to know the answer to. I was calmer, oh yes. I was aware. They saw nothing wrong, and neither did the nice people. How terrible I feel for tricking them. They really are very nice.

My poor sisters were the last to go. I saw it coming. I didn’t know when, and it took me two full months to figure out how, but I could feel it.

For her grand finale of sorts, the girl had taken my fan, the fan belonging to the boy on room over, and every other she could find on her way out.

The house was burned down by morning.

I awoke to the fan moving back and forth. Looking left and then right. Guarding my room from the things I cannot see. The constant whirr is calming and reassuring to my restless mind. I am restless. I am confused. I am dangerous. So I stay in this room because it is what’s good for everyone. I have a bed, and my fan. The constant whirr is very calming to my restless mind. It’s the only way I can live in this dark room alone.

title: Second edit, needs a title, any advice appreciated. (1,248 words)

question: Who does the narrator think the killer is?

answer: The narrator thinks the killer is the girl.

text: Specify who the girl is.

refinement: The narrator thinks the killer is the girl who lives down the hall.

answer: The narrator thinks the killer is a girl who is in the same room as the narrator.

text: Correct the inaccuracy: the girl is said to live down the hall, in the same home as the narrator, not the same room.

refinement: The narrator thinks the killer is a girl who is in the same home as the narrator.

answer: The narrator believes that the killer is the girl who has been sneaking out of her room at night.

text: 'I’ve watched the girl leave and return unnoticed three times. Each time claiming another victim.'

answer: A young girl.

text: 'There is a child down the hall from me that is not very pleasant though. I know all the things she has done.'

question: Where is the narrator sequestered except with good behavior or special circumstances?

answer: The narrator is sequestered in a mental institution.

text: Restricted freedoms on the basis of behaviour, family visiting times, periods of stay away from the place, mention of mental instability, and the presence of a house cat indicate a mental institution.

answer: The narrator is sequestered in a mental hospital.

text: Restricted freedoms on the basis of behaviour, family visiting times, periods of stay away from the place, mention of mental instability, and the presence of a house cat indicate a mental institution.

answer: The narrator is sequestered in a mental health facility.

text: Restricted freedoms on the basis of behaviour, family visiting times, periods of stay away from the place, mention of mental instability, and the presence of a house cat indicate a mental institution.

answer: Unclear, implied somewhere for people with mental health issues.

text: Restricted freedoms on the basis of behaviour, family visiting times, periods of stay away from the place, mention of mental instability, and the presence of a house cat indicate a mental institution.

question: Is the killer girl real?

answer: Yes, the killer girl is real.

text: It isn't stated, but the narrative implies the girl is a figment of the narrator's mind, so a definitive 'yes' is incorrect.

text: Add probability to make the answer less definitive.

answer: Yes, the girl is real.

text: It isn't stated, but the narrative implies the girl is a figment of the narrator's mind, so a definitive 'yes' is incorrect.

text: Add probability to make the answer less definitive.

answer: From the passage, it seems that the narrator believes that the girl is a real killer. However, the other characters in the story do not believe the narrator's claims.

text: The phrasing of the answer implies the girl is real, and her status as the killer is what's in doubt. Change this to reflect that the girl's very existence is in question.

refinement: From the passage, it seems that the narrator believes that the girl killer is real. However, the other characters in the story do not believe the narrator's claims.

answer: Unclear, may be a hallucination.

text: The possible hallucination is shown in the shift from 'That’s why she doesn’t get a nice room like the rest of us. Hers is darker, and there isn’t even a window. I don’t think she’s allowed visitors anymore either. The poor child' - to - 'It’s the only way I can live in this dark room alone.'

question: Who is the narrator?

answer: The narrator is a patient in a mental institution.

answer: The narrator is someone who is confined to a room in a mental institution, and who is aware of the crimes of another patient.

text: It would be more accurate to say the narrator 'claims' to be aware of the crimes of another patient.

refinement: The narrator is someone who is confined to a room in a mental institution, and who claims to be aware of the crimes of another patient.

answer: The narrator is a patient in a mental institution.

answer: Possibly a mental patient.

question: Write a ~3 sentence summary.

answer: The protagonist is a person who has been institutionalized due to their mental instability. They spend their days in a room with a fan, which they find calming, and they know that a serial killer is on the loose. The killer has killed the protagonist's mother and father, and set fire to the institution, killing the protagonist's sisters. The protagonist is aware of the killer's actions, but the people around them do not believe them.

text: Rephrase/re-organize the four sentences into three.

refinement: The protagonist is a person who has been institutionalized due to their mental instability. They spend their days in a room with a fan, which they find calming, and they know that a serial killer is on the loose, having killed the protagonist's mother and father, and set fire to the institution, killing the protagonist's sisters. The protagonist is aware of the killer's actions, but the people around them do not believe them.

text: Replace the last sentence with the more important detail of a potential delusion/hallucination.

refinement: The protagonist is a person who has been institutionalized due to their mental instability. They spend their days in a room with a fan, which they find calming, and they know that a serial killer is on the loose, having killed the protagonist's mother and father, and set fire to the institution, killing the protagonist's sisters. The narrative indicates the girl is a delusion or hallucination of the narrator, who is in fact responsible for the deaths.

answer: The narrator is a patient in a mental institution. They believe that a girl in the same institution is a serial killer who has killed their family members. The narrator believes that the girl is planning to kill them next.

text: The last sentence is not quite true (they know the girl is planning to kill their family, not them necessarily), so replace it with the more important detail of the potential delusion/hallucination.

refinement: The narrator is a patient in a mental institution. They believe that a girl in the same institution is a serial killer who has killed their family members. The narrative implies the girl is a delusion or hallucination of the narrator, who is in fact responsible for the deaths.

answer: The narrator is nearby to several deaths, each time seeing a young girl present. She believes the young girl is responsible, but the reader is lead to believe she may be a hallucination. The narrator is not allowed to leave where they live, possibly because they're mental patients.

text: The narrator's gender/pronouns are never given, and may not be the same as the girl, so change the instance of 'she' to the neutral 'they'.

refinement: The narrator is nearby to several deaths, each time seeing a young girl present. They believe the young girl is responsible, but the reader is lead to believe she may be a hallucination. The narrator is not allowed to leave where they live, possibly because they're mental patients.

answer: The protagonist is a woman who has been institutionalized for a long time. She is restless and confused, but she is also dangerous. She is in a room with a bed and a fan, and she is calm because of the fan's constant whirr. She is not allowed to leave the room, but she is allowed visitors. Her family visits her every week, but they don't come as often anymore. She knows that the girl who killed her mother is planning her next act, and she knows that the girl is not getting better. The girl leaves the room and comes back, and the protagonist knows that she is not getting better. The girl killed her father and her sisters, and the protagonist knows that the girl is not getting better. The girl killed the protagonist's father and sisters, and the protagonist knows that the girl is not getting better.

text: Remove the repeated sentences.

refinement: The protagonist is a woman who has been institutionalized for a long time. She is restless and confused, but she is also dangerous. She is in a room with a bed and a fan, and she is calm because of the fan's constant whirr. She is not allowed to leave the room, but she is allowed visitors. Her family visits her every week, but they don't come as often anymore. She knows that the girl who killed her mother is planning her next act, and she knows that the girl is not getting better.

text: The narrator's gender and pronouns are never given, so replace 'woman' and 'she/her' with more neutral terms.

refinement: The protagonist has been institutionalized for a long time. They are restless and confused, but also dangerous. They are in a room with a bed and a fan, and are calm because of the fan's constant whirr. They are not allowed to leave the room, but are allowed visitors. Their family visits every week, but they don't come as often anymore. They know that the girl who killed their mother is planning her next act, and they know that the girl is not getting better.

text: Remove the third, fourth, and fifth sentences to bring it to the required length.

refinement: The protagonist has been institutionalized for a long time. They are restless and confused, but also dangerous. They know that the girl who killed their mother is planning her next act, and they know that the girl is not getting better.

text: Replace the second sentence with the more important detail of the girl under suspicion.

refinement: The protagonist has been institutionalized for a long time. They suspect the young girl down the hall is a serial killer who is murdering their family members. They know that the girl who killed their mother is planning her next act, and they know that the girl is not getting better.

text: Replace the third sentence with the more important detail of the girl potentially being a delusion/hallucination.

refinement: The protagonist has been institutionalized for a long time. They suspect the young girl down the hall is a serial killer who is murdering their family members. The narrative indicates the girl is a delusion or hallucination of the narrator, who is in fact responsible for the deaths.


text:
We met two years ago.

I remember the first time I saw her. It was at orientation for our job. We were both starting a job working at an after school program for children. Our company worked at about 5 different schools, and after the general orientation was over, we all split up into our specific schools to met the people we'd be working with and to take ID pictures. There she was. Black, long hair. Bangs. Tons of freckly. Her upper lip curled a little beneath her nostrils when she smiled, creating a small wrinkle...almost another smile right beneath her nose. It was amazingly cute. She was beautiful. I had never seen anyone like her before. She just looked....happy. And kind. And she exuded it.

I remember I immediately thought to myself "She is the most beautiful girl I have ever seen."

And I meant it.

We started working together, looking after children grades K - 5 after they got out of school at the end of the day. We had about 80 kids total. So this girl and I got to know each other. She had a boyfriend at the end who she was deeply in love with, which was a bummer but whatever, I took the time to become her friend and to get to know her anyway.

She would tell me about her major at school, her very large family comprised of many adopted children, and how musical her family is. I'd tell her about me and my family, my music that I play, what i want to do with my life. We would just talk to each other and it made work amazing.

Sometimes she would look at me directly in the eye, and I would see a spark in her eye, and I'd feel that spark inside of me as well. IT was the craziest sensation. Never happened to me before. It was like small moments of our souls connecting.

So soon I find myself thinking about her all the time. I play in a band, and I would just close my eyes, think about her and play whatever came out while jamming. It was awesome. Soon she began appearing in my dreams on a nightly basis.

I don't remember being this attracted to any one person since I was in elementary school. I haven't had a "crush" on anyone since then. All of my hook ups or relationships were presented to me and I was basically like "Sure why not, I'll do it." It's been a while since there was one single person who made all other girls fade out.

I come into work one day and she runs up to me, shouts
"YOU WERE IN MY DREAM LAST NIGHT!" and then proceeds to tell me about her dream. I decide to keep my dreams about her to myself at this time, but the next few days she would come in and sure enough she had been dreaming about me again. I eventually told her about my dreams about her and she called us "DREAM BUDDIES", saying that we hang out in our dreams.

Then the summer came. Our job was coming to an end. She was going on a month long vacation, and I was starting up work at a summer camp. On our last day of usual work, I worked up the courage to ask for her phone number. I told her about a party at a friend's house that I was going to in her town (we lived in separate towns) and told her that she should come by and check it out.

She gave me her number.

On the day of the party, I chickened out and didn't text her.

My friends and I were house sitting at my friend's uncle's house that just happened to be in her town. We worked all day, then decided to start drinking and unwind. We decided we were all too tired for a big party and just had a couple friends over. I decided not to text her. So I start drinking, heavily, with my friends.

Then I get a text. "Party?"

I tell her to come by. She does. She gets high with me and my friends and we talk about music. She stays for about an hour and then gracefully excuses herself. It would be the last time I would see her for a while.

title: [RO][NF] Some lessons you learn the hard way.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the girl?

answer: The text implies that the girl is fun-loving and sociable. She was also persistent enough to stay at the party even though it was a scaled-back affair.

text: This isn't true in regards to the girl or party.

refinement: The text implies that the girl is fun-loving and sociable.

text: The majority of the information about the girl is omitted.

refinement: The girl is a co-worker of the narrator at an after school program for children, and is genuinely interested in getting to know the narrator better. It's implied that she could be fun-loving and sociable. She is beautiful with long black hair, bangs, freckles, and a demeanor of kindness. However, she has a boyfriend that she loves. The girl also has a big family that is musical. The girl labels she and the narrator "dream buddies" when she learns they dream about each other. She and the narrator get high together at a party before she excuses herself, and they don't see each other for a while.

answer: The text says that the girl is well-intentioned and open-minded, and also genuinely interested in getting to know the narrator better. She is friendly and confident in reaching out to people.

text: The story does not say this. This should be omitted.

refinement: The girl is genuinely interested in getting to know the narrator better. She is friendly and confident in reaching out to people.

text: The text doesn't really say this. The girl is just confident in reaching out to the narrator.

refinement: The girl is genuinely interested in getting to know the narrator better. She is friendly.

text: The majority of the details about the girl are omitted.

refinement: The girl is a co-worker of the narrator at an after school program for children, and is genuinely interested in getting to know the narrator better. She is friendly and beautiful with long black hair, bangs, freckles, and a demeanor of kindness. However, she has a boyfriend that she loves. The girl also has a big family that is musical. The girl labels she and the narrator "dream buddies" when she learns they dream about each other. She and the narrator get high together at a party before she excuses herself, and they don't see each other for a while.

answer: The girl is a co-worker at an after school program for children. The narrator finds her very attractive and attractive. She catches his attention because of her smile. The girl also has a big family and is musical by her family.

text: This is redundant and should be omitted.

refinement: The girl is a co-worker at an after school program for children. The narrator finds her very attractive. She catches his attention because of her smile. The girl also has a big family and is musical by her family.

text: This isn't necessarily true. Her appearance caught his attention. Omit this.

refinement: The girl is a co-worker at an after school program for children. The narrator finds her very attractive. The girl also has a big family and is musical by her family.

text: The girl's appearance should be described.

refinement: The girl is a co-worker at an after school program for children. The narrator finds her very attractive. She is beautiful with long black hair, bangs, freckles, and a demeanor of kindness. The girl also has a big family and is musical by her family.

text: Specify that the girl is a co-worker of the narrator's.

refinement: The girl is a co-worker of the narrator at an after school program for children. The narrator finds her very attractive. She is beautiful with long black hair, bangs, freckles, and a demeanor of kindness. The girl also has a big family and is musical by her family.

text: It's omitted that the girl has a boyfriend that she loves.

refinement: The girl is a co-worker of the narrator at an after school program for children. The narrator finds her very attractive. She is beautiful with long black hair, bangs, freckles, and a demeanor of kindness. However, she has a boyfriend that she loves. The girl also has a big family and is musical by her family.

text: "and is musical by her family" is awkward and should be fixed.

refinement: The girl is a co-worker of the narrator at an after school program for children. The narrator finds her very attractive. She is beautiful with long black hair, bangs, freckles, and a demeanor of kindness. However, she has a boyfriend that she loves. The girl also has a big family that is musical.

text: It's omitted the girl labels she and the narrator "dream buddies" when she learns they dream about each other.

refinement: The girl is a co-worker of the narrator at an after school program for children. The narrator finds her very attractive. She is beautiful with long black hair, bangs, freckles, and a demeanor of kindness. However, she has a boyfriend that she loves. The girl also has a big family that is musical. The girl labels she and the narrator "dream buddies" when she learns they dream about each other.

text: It's omitted that she and the narrator get high together at a party before she excuses herself and they don't see each other for a while.

refinement: The girl is a co-worker of the narrator at an after school program for children. The narrator finds her very attractive. She is beautiful with long black hair, bangs, freckles, and a demeanor of kindness. However, she has a boyfriend that she loves. The girl also has a big family that is musical. The girl labels she and the narrator "dream buddies" when she learns they dream about each other. She and the narrator get high together at a party before she excuses herself, and they don't see each other for a while.

answer: The narrator seems to be mesmerized by his coworker, who is called an "amazing" "beautiful" girl with black hair and bangs, who had a dreamy, happy and kind demeanor. She was beautiful. The narrator finds her attractive, and states he is attracted to her. He struggled to get the courage to ask for her phone number, and called her "dream buddies" after he received her text for the invitation to the party.

text: This is redundant, as it's already stated in the first sentence. Omit this.

refinement: The narrator seems to be mesmerized by his coworker, who is called an "amazing" "beautiful" girl with black hair and bangs, who had a dreamy, happy and kind demeanor. The narrator finds her attractive, and states he is attracted to her. He struggled to get the courage to ask for her phone number, and called her "dream buddies" after he received her text for the invitation to the party.

text: This is redundant and should be omitted.

refinement: The narrator seems to be mesmerized by his coworker, who is called an "amazing" "beautiful" girl with black hair and bangs, who had a dreamy, happy and kind demeanor. The narrator finds her attractive. He struggled to get the courage to ask for her phone number, and called her "dream buddies" after he received her text for the invitation to the party.

text: It's omitted that the girl has a boyfriend she loves.

refinement: The narrator seems to be mesmerized by his coworker, who is called an "amazing" "beautiful" girl with black hair and bangs, who had a dreamy, happy and kind demeanor. The narrator finds her attractive. However, she has a boyfriend she loves. He struggled to get the courage to ask for her phone number, and called her "dream buddies" after he received her text for the invitation to the party.

text: It's omitted that the girl comes from an interesting family.

refinement: The narrator seems to be mesmerized by his coworker, who is called an "amazing" "beautiful" girl with black hair and bangs, who had a dreamy, happy and kind demeanor. She also comes from an interesting family. The narrator finds her attractive. However, she has a boyfriend she loves. He struggled to get the courage to ask for her phone number, and called her "dream buddies" after he received her text for the invitation to the party.

text: The girl isn't described as having a "dreamy" demeanor. This should be omitted.

refinement: The narrator seems to be mesmerized by his coworker, who is called an "amazing" "beautiful" girl with black hair and bangs, who had a happy and kind demeanor. She also comes from an interesting family. The narrator finds her attractive. However, she has a boyfriend she loves. He struggled to get the courage to ask for her phone number, and called her "dream buddies" after he received her text for the invitation to the party.

text: This is information about the narrator, not the girl. It should be omitted.

refinement: The narrator seems to be mesmerized by his coworker, who is called an "amazing" "beautiful" girl with black hair and bangs, who had a happy and kind demeanor. She also comes from an interesting family. The narrator finds her attractive. However, she has a boyfriend she loves. He called her "dream buddies" after he received her text for the invitation to the party.

text: This is false. The girl calls them dreams buddies after learning they both dream about each other.

refinement: The narrator seems to be mesmerized by his coworker, who is called an "amazing" "beautiful" girl with black hair and bangs, who had a happy and kind demeanor. She also comes from an interesting family. The narrator finds her attractive. However, she has a boyfriend she loves. The girl calls them "dreams buddies" after learning she and the narrator dream about each other.

text: It's omitted that after getting high with the narrator at a party, the girl excuses herself and they don't see each other for a while.

refinement: The narrator seems to be mesmerized by his coworker, who is called an "amazing" "beautiful" girl with black hair and bangs, who had a happy and kind demeanor. She also comes from an interesting family. The narrator finds her attractive. However, she has a boyfriend she loves. The girl calls them "dreams buddies" after learning she and the narrator dream about each other. After getting high with the narrator at a party, the girl excuses herself and they don't see each other for a while.

answer: She and the narrator are colleagues, taking care of kids after school. The narrator thinks she's the most beautiful girl he has ever seen. However, she has a boyfriend she loves. She and the narrator become close friends. At some point, she appears in the narrator's dreams every night. The girl also sees him in her dreams and declares them as dream buddies. Their job ends in summer, and he asks for her number. They see each other for the last time at a party after the narrator hesitates to call her because she asks.

text: It's omitted that the girl has an interesting family.

refinement: She and the narrator are colleagues, taking care of kids after school. The narrator thinks she's the most beautiful girl he has ever seen. She has an interesting family. However, she has a boyfriend she loves. She and the narrator become close friends. At some point, she appears in the narrator's dreams every night. The girl also sees him in her dreams and declares them as dream buddies. Their job ends in summer, and he asks for her number. They see each other for the last time at a party after the narrator hesitates to call her because she asks.

text: It's omitted that the narrator believes the girl exudes kindness.

refinement: She and the narrator are colleagues, taking care of kids after school. The narrator thinks she's the most beautiful girl he has ever seen. She has an interesting family and the narrator thinks she exudes kindness. However, she has a boyfriend she loves. She and the narrator become close friends. At some point, she appears in the narrator's dreams every night. The girl also sees him in her dreams and declares them as dream buddies. Their job ends in summer, and he asks for her number. They see each other for the last time at a party after the narrator hesitates to call her because she asks.

text: This is information about the narrator, not the girl.

refinement: She and the narrator are colleagues, taking care of kids after school. The narrator thinks she's the most beautiful girl he has ever seen. She has an interesting family and the narrator thinks she exudes kindness. However, she has a boyfriend she loves. She and the narrator become close friends. At some point, she appears in the narrator's dreams every night. The girl also sees him in her dreams and declares them as dream buddies. They see each other for the last time at a party after the narrator hesitates to call her because she asks.

text: This sentence is confusing. It would be better to say that the girl shows up to a party, and excuses herself an hour after getting high with the narrator.

refinement: She and the narrator are colleagues, taking care of kids after school. The narrator thinks she's the most beautiful girl he has ever seen. She has an interesting family and the narrator thinks she exudes kindness. However, she has a boyfriend she loves. She and the narrator become close friends. At some point, she appears in the narrator's dreams every night. The girl also sees him in her dreams and declares them as dream buddies. The girl shows up to a party, and excuses herself an hour after getting high with the narrator.


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ZWANENBURG, The Netherlands--(BUSINESS WIRE)--AEG Power Solutions (FWB:3W9K), a global provider of power electronic systems and solutions for industrial power supplies and renewable energy applications, today announced it has been chosen by UniEnergy Technologies (UET) to supply Protect SC.600 storage converters for their Uni.System™.

UET produces innovative large-scale battery energy storage systems for utility, commercial and industrial, micro-grid, and other applications. In particular, the systems are able to help overcome challenges in adding renewable energy sources to the public grid, including grid stabilization and grid leveling. The Uni.System provides unlimited cycles, 20 year life, and use of the battery’s full state-of-charge,

The AEG Power Solutions (AEG PS) storage converters are installed at two sites. Firstly, at UET’s headquarters in Mukilteo, Washington, USA on the Harbour Pointe distribution circuit, they are being used by UET for production and acceptance testing in a 2 megawatt/4hrs (8 MWh) installation. Secondly, the storage converters are included in UET’s 1 megawatt/4hrs (4 MWh) deployment on the Turner distribution circuit at a manufacturing facility in Pullman, Washington, USA.

UET selected the Protect SC.600 because of its outstanding mix of features and benefits. In particular, the company was impressed by its wide voltage and current range, its flexibility in configuration, and its small physical footprint.

Protect SC.600 is a bi-directional power converter based on IGBT technology. In battery energy storage systems, it transforms the battery’s chemically stored energy into a useful grid service by supply the right electric component, at the right time, with the right amount and form of electrical power. Protect SC.600 has high efficiency for charging and discharging and a wide DC input range, so can be used with any state of the art battery technology currently available.

“With the increasing shift to renewables, there is a growing need to manage how electrical power is provided to the grid,” says Stefan Kempen, Product Manager at AEG Power Solutions. “UET’s energy storage systems are an innovative solution that will help utilities add more renewables, and simplify how they are integrated with other sources.”

UET delivers megawatt-scale energy storage solutions for both power and energy simultaneously. Projects to date include for utilities, commercial and industrial, and micro‐grids. The core patented technology is an advanced vanadium flow battery, with breakthrough electrolyte developed at PNNL, with funding from the US DOE. The Uni.System™ features a plug & play ISO containerized design, state‐of‐the‐art controls, and power electronics. The water-based technology is inherently safe, operationally flexible, reliable, long‐life, and economically compelling. The Uni.System installed in Pullman WA, is the largest deployed flow battery in North America and Europe, supporting demand response, peak shaving, renewable generation integration, ramping, and frequency and voltage regulation.

For more information on UET, please visit http://www.uetechnologies.com.

ABOUT AEG POWER SOLUTIONS
AEG Power Solutions (AEG PS) Group is a global provider of power electronics systems and solutions for all industrial and demanding commercial power requirements offering one of the most comprehensive product and service portfolios in the area of uninterruptible power supply and power management.

Thanks to its distinctive expertise bridging both AC and DC power technologies and spanning the worlds of both conventional and renewable energy, the company creates innovative solutions for next generation distributed power generation.

AEG Power Solutions Group is the sole subsidiary of the holding company 3W Power S.A. (WKN A114Z9) / ISINLU1072910919), based in Luxembourg. The Group is headquartered in Zwanenburg in the Netherlands. The shares of 3W Power are admitted to trading on Frankfurt Stock Exchange (ticker symbol: 3W9K).

For more information, visit www.aegps.com.

_This communication does not constitute an offer or the solicitation of an offer to buy, sell or exchange any securities of 3W Power. This communication contains forward-looking statements which include, inter alia, statements expressing our expectations, intentions, projections, estimates, and assumptions. These forward-looking statements are based on the reasonable evaluation and opinion of the management but are subject to risks and uncertainties which are beyond the control of 3W Power and, as a general rule, difficult to predict. The management and the company cannot and do not, under any circumstances, guarantee future results or performance of 3W Power and the actual results of 3W Power may materially differ from the information expressed or implied in the forward-looking statements. As a result, investors are cautioned against relying on the forward-looking statements contained herein as a basis for their investment decisions regarding 3W Power._

_3W Power undertakes no obligation to update or revise any forward-looking statement contained herein._

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about UET's advanced vanadium flow technology?

answer: UET's energy storage systems are an innovative solution that will help utilities add more renewables, and simplify how they are integrated with other sources. The core technology is an advanced vanadium flow battery, with breakthrough electrolyte developed at PNNL, with funding from the US DOE. The water-based technology is inherently safe, operationally flexible, reliable, long-life, and economically compelling. The Uni.System installed in Pullman is the largest deployed flow battery in North America and Europe, supporting demand response, peak shaving, renewable generation integration, ramping, and frequency and voltage regulation.

answer: UET's energy storage systems are based on an advanced vanadium flow battery. The technology is capable of supporting demand response, peak shaving, renewable generation integration, and other grid services.

answer: UET's advanced vanadium flow battery technology is designed to help utilities add more renewables and simplify integration with other sources. The technology also comes with a range of advantages, including being inherently safe, operationally flexible, reliable, long-life, and economically compelling.

answer: UET produces a wide range of energy storage solutions with their patented technology. It is an advanced vanadium flow battery. The article stated that that technology was developed at the Pacific Northwest National Laboratory, with the help of U.S. DOE.

answer: It's an energy storage converter. It's inherently safe, flexible, and long-lasting. It operates at megawatt scale, supports demand response, peak shaving, renewable generation integration, ramping, frequency, and voltage regulation. UET utilizes AEG's Protect SC.600 power converters in their systems.