text:
My long walk in the dark began with a sobbing girlfriend and two barking dogs in the neighbors back yard. My jacket hung loosely on my shoulders as I fiddled with some loose change and a key in my pockets. For the first ten minutes, I expected her to come running behind me and ask me to come back home. An hour after that I had forgotten what we were fighting about in the first place.

The city lights flooded my vision, creating a contrast with the shadows. I felt them move, like a wanderer with nowhere to go, pacing back and forth. My tired feet approached a particularly black intersection. A large van slowed to a stop in front of me. The driver, a man in his forties, had a baseball cap on shadowing his eyes. He didn’t notice me and pulled out into the street as I waited to cross. I stared at his face as he passed, it was angry. Impossibly angry, he was searching for someone. ‘I’m glad I’m not on that guys bad side,’ I thought to myself once the van was gone from my sight.

As I continued along the lonely path I noticed the shadow on the wall at the next allyway move, ever so slightly. My eyes fixed on it as I made my somber approach. I’d never been mugged before and was preparing to run if I had to. Out of the shadows stepped a tall man, middle aged and wearing a lab coat. His right hand clamped around a small metallic device. I jumped back assuming a pistol was pointing at me. His other hand clutched the growing red stain on his chest.

“It’s… Stuck...  … … No.. Going… Back.” He collapsed in front of me.

I don’t remember anything after that. My mind went blank for a while, just switched off.

When my brain came back online, I was holding a small metal machine in my hand. I stared at it for a minute. It was completely, amazingly, fantastically… unremarkable in any way. Rectangular, shaped like a tv remote, but buttonless. It had a smooth stainless steel casing. The only thing protruding out was a knob. The knob was black plastic and had a notch at the top.

I headed back home quickly.

The front door creaked as I opened it. My expectation was that my girlfriend had calmed down and gone to bed, but I was mistaken. Within a minute we were at it again. Arguing about nothing, using anything as an excuse to try to hurt each others feelings. She noticed me holding the device and slapped it to the ground. The knob turned two clicks to the right.

Immediately the hate in her eyes dissipated. I was still furious and grabbed the gadget back up off the ground. I set it in my jacket pocket and as it slid in the knob turned once more to the right. She couldn’t contain herself anymore and grabbed me by the neck pulling me in for a passionate and heavy kiss, moaning against my bottom lip. She pulled me back into the bedroom and we had life affirming, wonderful sex.

The next weeks were marvelous. Jennifer, my girlfriend, was in love with me again. My coworkers were happy to see me. My boss even gave me a raise! I was flying high and loving life.

Something tugged at me though, curiosity reared its ugly head. The gadget hadn’t left my side since I had found it. I had made sure that the knob stayed two clicks to the right of center. My incorrigible side tugged at me relentlessly with what if’s.

One evening, Jennifer was cooking me another delicious dinner. I worked up the courage to test my hypothesis, and reached into my pocket. The smooth device fit snugly in my hand as I pulled it out of my pocket. Jennifer was looking away, half consumed with the steaks on the fryer. She used the rest of her attention to hurl verbal accolades at me. I took a deep breath and turned the knob all the way, counter clockwise to the left. The notch on the knob hit found its end.

Immediately Jennifer ended all movement, stopping her sentence jarringly. She breathed in deeply and began shaking. “Honey, are you ok?” I asked.

The silence was deafening. She took a large breath and grabbed the frying pan. The pan came flying to my face with a force I didn’t think my petite girlfriend could muster. It missed by an inch as I fell back in surprise. Her eyes were wild with a level of hate I had previously only seen in my nightmares.

My back landed on the hard linoleum flooring and I skirted backwards in horror. She wound the pan back behind her head again, and with both hands swung it down toward my face. In a move of self preservation I turned my head away and held my hands out to take the blow. The pan crashed against the steel and plastic of the device, shattering the knob into a hundred evil pieces. The shock reverberated through my hands, shattering the bones in three of my right fingers.

I kicked as hard as I could into her kneecap. She fell, howling in pain. My gut told me to get out of there but I couldn’t just leave her lying there in pain. I got up and walked over to her, I put the broken device back in my pocket and knelt down beside her.

“Honey, it’s over now.” I said, attempting to reassure her. She took her focus off of the broken leg and turned her gaze toward me. My blood boiled as her eyes met mine. My beautiful Jennifer was gone. All that was left was rage in her eyes. In a split second, her hands came up to my neck, choking me with all the force she could rally. She couldn’t even bring herself to speak. Nothing but guttural hisses and whines escaped her clamped jaw.

I panicked and struggled for breath. Her thumbs collapsing my esophagus and shutting off the blood to my brain. My vision blurred and became dark as I began to pass out. I saw the frying pan, still on the floor. With my precious seconds of life still clinging to me, I grabbed it with my unbroken hand and smacked her on the top of the head. She let go of her death grip and I collapsed onto her chest. I heard her heart, still beating furiously in her chest.

I gathered my strength and picked myself up. Everything was ruined. My only option was to call the police. I knew once they got there they would fall under the spell of the device as well, but I had to get Jennifer help.

From inside the garage I could hear the sirens as the ambulance and police found their way to my house. The sound of the first responders closing their doors was muffled by the sound of my hammer whaling against stainless steel.

title: [RF] How I Lost Control

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the relationship the narrator had with his girlfriend.

answer: The relationship that the narrator had with his girlfriend was quite rocky. They were both fighting, and fighting a lot. The narrator had even forgotten about what they were fighting about and was in a miserable state of mind. When the knob came into the possession of the narrator, it can be seen that the girlfriend softens and longs for him. But then, when the narrator tries to use the magic of the knob, his girlfriend becomes a monster who is trying to kill him.

text: I would call the device something other than "the knob"

refinement: The relationship that the narrator had with his girlfriend was quite rocky. They were both fighting, and fighting a lot. The narrator had even forgotten about what they were fighting about and was in a miserable state of mind. When the device came into the possession of the narrator, it can be seen that the girlfriend softens and longs for him. But then, when the narrator tries to use the magic of the device, his girlfriend becomes a monster who is trying to kill him.

answer: The narrator and his girlfriend, Jennifer, had a rocky relationship. Things went bad when the narrator came into possession of an object, which Jennifer did not like. When Jennifer found out that the narrator had the object, she was uncharacteristically angry.

text: Jennifer is not angry because the narrator has the object; the object controls her

refinement: The narrator and his girlfriend, Jennifer, had a rocky relationship. When the narrator finds the device, he returns home, and they resume arguing. The knob on the device is turned, which causes Jennifer to immediately fall madly in love with the narrator. After a while, the narrator decides to try turning the device's knob down as far as possible, which causes Jennifer to try to kill him.

answer: Initially the narrator was fighting with his girlfriend. After the narrator had decided to leave after arguing with his girlfriend, the narrator had sex with her. They also seemed to be in some sort of relationship.  After the narrator had found a weird gadget, he and his girlfriend seemed to go back to how they were after using the gadget.

text: The device is what causes the narrator and Jennifer to fall in love again

refinement: Initially the narrator was fighting with his girlfriend. The narrator finds a device with a knob, and when it is turned, Jennifer suddenly stops being angry and falls madly in love with the narrator. After the narrator had found a weird gadget, he and his girlfriend seemed to go back to how they were after using the gadget.

text: The narrator tries changing the setting on the device and Jennifer hates him, which is more than going "back to how they were"

refinement: Initially the narrator was fighting with his girlfriend. The narrator finds a device with a knob, and when it is turned, Jennifer suddenly stops being angry and falls madly in love with the narrator. After a while, the narrator tries turning the knob to its lowest possible setting, which makes Jennifer hate him and try to kill him.

answer: The narrator's relationship was initially good, but devolved into horrible fighting. His girlfriend became angry and hostile, and the narrator could no longer calm her down when he used the device. Eventually, he resorted to smashing the device in the hopes of making her realize what's happening. When the emergency responders arrived on the scene, the girlfriend became even more hostile, and strangled the narrator until he passed out. He destroyed the device so she could get help without becoming violently hostile. The relationship has deteriorated into violence and confusion.

text: Very misleading/inaccurate response

text: Provide a response

refinement: At the beginning of the story, Jennifer and the narrator are in an argument. The narrator finds a device with a knob, which causes Jennifer to fall madly in love with him. He tries turning the knob to its lowest setting, which makes Jennifer hate him and try to kill him.

answer: The narrator's relationship with his girlfriend was initially good, but gradually deteriorated. The narrator discovers an unusual machine which has the power to control relationships. His girlfriend becomes aggressive when he turns the knob on the machine, and nearly kills him with a frying pan before he uses the machine to defend himself. The relationship ultimately failed.

text: The device makes Jennifer love the narrator before it makes her hate him

refinement: The narrator's relationship with his girlfriend was initially good, but gradually deteriorated. The narrator discovers an unusual machine which has the power to control relationships. At first, it makes her fall madly in love with him. His girlfriend becomes aggressive when he turns the knob on the machine, and nearly kills him with a frying pan before he uses the machine to defend himself. The relationship ultimately failed.

text: The narrator defends himself with the frying pan, and to say the relationship failed is a significant understatement

refinement: The narrator's relationship with his girlfriend was initially good, but gradually deteriorated. The narrator discovers an unusual machine which has the power to control relationships. At first, it makes her fall madly in love with him. His girlfriend becomes aggressive when he turns the knob on the machine, and nearly kills him with a frying pan before he uses the frying pan to defend himself.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the plot twist in this story.

answer: The plot twist in this story comes in the form of a knob. The narrator came into possession of this knob when he saw a middle aged man collapse in front of him, holding on to the device. Before the narrator knows it, the device is in his hand and he realized the power of it when he has a fight with his girlfriend and she knocks the knob over. The knob turns two clicks to the right and his always arguing girlfriend seems to love and long for him. That is when the narrator slowly comes to understand the power of the knob.

text: I think it's important to include that the knob also makes the girlfriend hate the narrator

refinement: The plot twist in this story comes in the form of a knob. The narrator came into possession of this knob when he saw a middle aged man collapse in front of him, holding on to the device. Before the narrator knows it, the device is in his hand and he realized the power of it when he has a fight with his girlfriend and she knocks the knob over. The knob turns two clicks to the right and his always arguing girlfriend seems to love and long for him. That is when the narrator slowly comes to understand the power of the knob. Later, the narrator tries turning the knob the other way, which makes Jennifer hate him and try to kill him.

answer: Narrator encounters a wounded man in a vehicle. He stops to help before his girlfriend arrives. The man dies, clutching the device. Narrator flips to the middle setting, causing his girlfriend to want to fight him-then they have sex. The narrator manipulates the device a third time, which causes his girlfriend to become extremely angry and attack him. He snaps the knob, accidentally killing her initially. As she clutches his neck, he strikes her with a frying pan, her last breaths escaping her as she dies.

text: Very misleading/inaccurate response

text: Provide a response

refinement: In her rage, Jennifer smashes the device's knob, which prevents the narrator from undoing its effects.

answer: The plot twist occurs when the main character returns home from the shower after destroying the device and finds that his girlfriend is furious and attacks him. The plot twist is that the main character had forgotten all about the switch on the device, which turns people into vulnerable love-sick idiots.

answer: The protagonist finds a device that grants romantic desires and bliss. Experimenting with the gadget's knob, the protagonist realizes it has the power to change the behavior and feelings of others. When the protagonist turns the knob to the left, the person they care about most becomes violently aggressive. They have to destroy the device in order to save their own life.

answer: The protagonist finds a device that turns people into homicidal maniacs. The protagonist attempts to test the device, but it only causes problems: Jennifer inexplicably becomes violent, assaulting the protagonist with a frying pan. In a last ditch attempt to offer aid, the protagonist smashes the device and hits Jennifer over the head. The first responders eventually arrive to help, but behind the violence and chaos, the protagonist realizes the device has permanently corrupted Jennifer.


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text:
This is a short story I wrote for a writing contest. I lost, but I liked this story so I figured I'd get some more opinions. Besides, just losing doesn't tell me how to improve.

Kosmonaut

Peace. Bleak, black, emptiness. Is there anything more to life than that?

I have been circling Earth for months now. I once knew what it was like on the surface. Going day to day, ambling from work to home and home to work. No thought, no excitement. Just life. I once thought there was nothing more than that. But now, seeing the universe and all of its glory from my minuscule metallic prison, I can see that I was wrong.

I feel I am a lost sentinel, a castaway guardian of the earth. Silently I watch as burning stars and glowing satellites fly past me. I observe everything, and nothing will touch me. Nothing can surpass me; and nothing has or ever will. I am the sole caretaker of the universe. I can see into the oblivion and sense and feel all that is around me. There is nothing I cannot bear witness to. The cold metal box I call home is the only barrier between me and the beyond. It is my citadel, my prison and my liberation. I cannot be touched by anything, only enlightenment. It is wonderful.

Floating weightlessly through my metal cocoon, I can stare into the vastness of space and know that I am alone and yet not alone. I can be no more alone anywhere than in space, thousands of miles from earth. Not a voice heard but my own; even my radio has died. The only face I see is in the mirror. I am only touched by filtered air. And yet being so close to worlds I do not know gives me hope that I am not as alone as I appear to be. The vastness that I view bestows upon me the knowledge of life not yet seen. I can feel it.

I look out the windows, beyond the fogged glass, and see nearly eternal blackness. There is no day in space. There is only light from one window, the one facing the sun. Perpetual sun. No setting. No night and no day. Out the other window, I can see into eternity. Every shining star, every galaxy and asteroid, every single speck of glowing space. I can see it all. And it is beautiful.

I realize my time in heaven is coming to an end. My mission was slated for only a year. That time bled away in an instant. A blink of an eye, and I am being taken away. A minuscule fish in a vast sea, being reeled in on a hook and line. Too soon. Too soon.

Knowing that I will lose my endless bliss is difficult to bear. As I sit and stare through the glass, I ponder ways of staying. I have no radio to contact Earth. Mankind is nonexistent here.

I am due back home in just a week's time. But there is no home to return to. I have thought long and hard about my life, both free and earth bound. Now, I don my suit.

Bound to my metal prison, I drift into nothingness. Through my visor I can see the stars and galaxies clearer than ever before. They surround me. I am not behind them; they are not in front of me. I am within them. I feel the strongest sense of peace and belonging. I am in nothing and nothing is in me. I am eternity.

I feel a tug as I reach the end of my tether. I detach the clip from my belt.

I am swimming in a sea of emptiness. The stars are all within sight, but never within my grasp. I can feel the weight of time pressing heavy on my chest. Eons bore through my skull. A millennia passes before my eyes. My life is irrelevant. I cherish it.

My angle changes, the earth covers the stars. One cloud covers most of the land; a milky charcoal mass smothering green life. Oceans, radiant blue against the blackness of space. Life on earth is rendered invisible. Insignificant. Nothing compares to the universe.

I can see into space and time. I am falling into oblivion. I can see my space pod drift away from me. All is gone. I am at peace. I am nothing and I am everything. I am eternity. Just before I drift out of sight, I hear the soft echo of radio static.

title: Kosmonaut

question: Who is the narrator?

answer: A Kosmonaut in space

text: No answer!

answer: The narrator is a space traveler exploring and observing the universe.

question: Where is the story set?

answer: The story is set in outer space and a remote outpost somewhere.

text: The story is set in low Earth orbit.

answer: Somewhere in space, presumably in Earth orbit

answer: The story takes place both in space and on Earth.

text: The story is set in space, orbiting Earth.

refinement: The story is set in space, orbiting Earth.

question: How did the narrator get here?

answer: The narrator was chosen for a mission to space, and seems to have ultimately found contentment in looking out into the cosmos. At the end of the story, however, she realizes that her time is up and decides to cut her rope tethering her space pod to Earth, letting herself float into nothingness.

text: The end of this is not necessary.

refinement: The narrator was chosen for a mission to space, and seems to have ultimately found contentment in looking out into the cosmos.

answer: The narrator has been on a year-long mission

answer: It is difficult to determine for certain, but the narrator seems to be a part of some kind of space expedition. They are about ready to return home when they decide to detach from their spacecraft, allowing themselves to "drift out of sight" and experience the immense beauty of the universe.

question: In what time period does the story take place?

answer: It must be sometime after the development of space flight

answer: The story appears to take place in the present.

answer: The story appears to take place sometime in the distant future, when mankind has started to explore out into space.

text: Not necessarily.

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: The narrator is alone in a capsule in space, nearing the end of their one-year mission. They enjoy watching the universe from up there, and they don't want to return to Earth, so they go on a spacewalk and release their tether, drifting off into space.

answer: The character sees the universe from their distant space pod, finally understanding its beauty and importance. They then decide to end their own life by drifting into the emptiness of space, content with seeing the universe for as long as they can.

text: Wrong vehicle.

refinement: The character sees the universe from their space suit, finally understanding its beauty and importance. They then decide to end their own life by drifting into the emptiness of space, content with seeing the universe for as long as they can.

answer: This story is about a space traveler who looks out at the universe—seeing all the galaxies and stars—before drifting away. The traveler has a sense of peace as they slip into oblivion, finally seeing the universe around them as it truly is.

answer: In the short story, the protagonist realizes they cannot stay in space forever, and decides to drift away to their own peaceful oblivion; ultimately realizing that the universe is the most beautiful thing they have seen.

text: More context.

refinement: In the short story, an astronaut realizes they cannot stay in space forever, and decides to drift away to their own peaceful oblivion; ultimately realizing that the universe is the most beautiful thing they have seen.

answer: The narrator feels at peace when floating in space, and decides to end their mission prematurely by detaching their tether and drifting into the oblivion. In their final moments, they realize the infinite beauty and mystery of the universe, and feel that life on Earth is insignificant in comparison.

answer: The protagonist lives mainly in space, viewing the universe from their metal capsule. They come to understand and cherish their time in space, until they must come back to life on earth. In their final moments, the protagonist accepts that life on earth is small compared to the vastness of space. They come to terms with their death and are at peace with the unknown.


text:
Online, onscreen, on CKUT community radio, via street art in your town, and with dancing! Join us from anywhere and everywhere!

This year’s Montreal Anarchist Bookfair, Sunday, May 17, 2020. Connecting ideas across distance from 10:30 a.m. to midnight EDT.

Tabling this year will be a bit different. But what would a bookfair be without books! We encourage you to “stroll around” the TABLERS 2020 on May 17. You’ll find deals and free stuff, and you can support anarchistic publishers, artists, and others struggling to survive during COVID-19. In addition, check out the Art and Anarchy call for street art on physical walls in various cities, and online workshops, talks, and chat rooms. We’ll also be hosting a film screening and rounding off the day with a special DJ set “dance” party!

To listen or join into the workshops, 11 am to 6 pm, you need to download MUMBLE, a free open-source voice chat program, where we will be hosting them: HERE IS AN EASY TO FOLLOW GUIDE! You can also listen in onCKUT’S STREAM from 11 am to 4 pm!

IF THE CKUT STREAM IS NOT WORKING – TRY THIS:

Due to the high volume of traffic it is possible that you will not be able to stream ckut.ca. If this is the case you can go toHTTP://CKUT.AIRTIME.PRO/. Click the play button at the bottom of the screen next to LIVE DJ or the name of the show
You can also listen to us on Radio Player:HTTP://RADIOPLAYER.CKUT.CA/

To watch the film, see Pom Poko. To dance via Zoom, see Beneath the Paving Stones.

We also have a public chatroom, accessible on any web browser here. It is important to note that _what is said in this chatroom is** public**_. Apart from anything else that people want to say, we’re hoping that this space can be used to request help with any problems one might experience with software or access to our event.

_Note_: As you know, this bookfair came together under difficult circumstances, and we haven’t been able to set up all of our usual practices. That said, we’re still committed to trying to make the bookfair as accessible as possible. If you’re attending a talk and would be willing to either simultaneously transcribe it for anybody who needs an alternative to audio or do simultaneous interpretation from French to English or English to French, please let us know. If you require transcription or translation for a particular workshop, please get in touch as soon as possible and we’ll do our best.

MONTREAL ANARCHIST BOOKFAIR, MAY 17, 2020, SCHEDULE

All day – Art and Anarchy – Open Chat – Tablers

11 am : L’anarchisme et le Mouvement de la Science Transparente (fr)

11:30 am :  Liberating Sápmi: Indigenous Resistance in Europe’s Far North (en)

Noon :  Conversations with Gidimt’en: Updates from the Front Lines (en)

1 pm : Mutual Aid for Survival and Freedom (en)

        2 pm : Collective Care vs. Containment (en)

3 pm : Antifascism during Pandemic (en)

4 pm : Dialed In: A Conversation with Radio Pandemic (en)

5 pm : Grief Space  (fr/en)

6:30 pm : Pom Poko (fr/en) (film)

9 pm : Beneath the Paving Stones, the Dance Floor!

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Call for “Art and Anarchy” across Distance

The twenty-first edition of the Montreal Anarchist Bookfair has to look radically different this year, but we’re striving for as much connection across distance as we can during our daylong gathering on Sunday, May 17, 2020. To that end, rather than our usual Art and Anarchy exhibit in the physical bookfair space, we’re calling on people to physically share anarchistic art and banners on the streets of cities across the globe. It’s a way of embodying our love and solidarity for each other, and also illustrating quite literally that we’re still here, that anarchism is still alive and well.

The idea is simple. On or before May 17:

-   Put up street art and/or a banner—your own and/or others’ creations
-   Take photos, or get a friend to do so
-   Post the photo(s) on social media, or get friends to do it, with the hashtag #ArtAndAnarchy. Include the location, as general or specific as you want
-   Share it with us at (info [at] anarchistbookfair [dot] ca), so we can then post it on our website and potentially use it, with your permission, in a post-bookfair zine

Please spread the word far and wide. It would be so beautiful to see art and anarchism spread across borders and walls around the world, bringing us closer together.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How do you join the CKUT stream?

answer: To listen or join into the workshops, 11 am to 6 pm, you need to download Mumble, a free open-source voice chat program.

text: The answer is technically correct, but the article provides an in-depth set of instructions so the summary should reflect this better.

refinement: First you must download MUMBLE, a free open-source voice chat program. If you cannot stream it due to the high volume of traffic at ckut.ca, got to ckut.airtime.pro . You then click the play button at the bottom of the screen next to LIVE DJ or the name of the show.

answer: Go to ckut.ca, click the play button at the bottom of the screen next to LIVE DJ or the name of the show.

text: There are instructions for how to connect if an error is encountered. This should be included in the summary since it is pertinent information related to the answer.

refinement: First you must download MUMBLE, a free open-source voice chat program. If you cannot stream it due to the high volume of traffic at ckut.ca, got to ckut.airtime.pro . You then click the play button at the bottom of the screen next to LIVE DJ or the name of the show.

answer: You will need to download the MUMBLE open source voice chat program

text: The article goes into detail with the instructions and this should be reflected in the summary.

refinement: First you must download MUMBLE, a free open-source voice chat program. If you cannot stream it due to the high volume of traffic at ckut.ca, got to ckut.airtime.pro . You then click the play button at the bottom of the screen next to LIVE DJ or the name of the show.

answer: First you must download MUMBLE, a free open-source voice chat program. If you cannot stream it due to the high volume of traffic at ckut.ca, got to ckut.airtime.pro . You then click the play button at the bottom of the screen next to LIVE DJ or the name of the show.

answer: You can go to their stream page and append the URL.

text: The details in this summary are too vague in comparison to the article which gives clearer instructions.

refinement: First you must download MUMBLE, a free open-source voice chat program. If you cannot stream it due to the high volume of traffic at ckut.ca, got to ckut.airtime.pro . You then click the play button at the bottom of the screen next to LIVE DJ or the name of the show.


text:
     It's funny how people act in the coffee rooms at funeral homes. They're all sad or they act sad out of respect. They all drink coffee and eat the cookies that they put out on the table, and they talk about how the body looks for a while, then they start talking about politics or the weather or some damn boring thing. It happens at every viewing I've ever been to. I even do it. I sat there the other night at my great aunts viewing and I nodded my head when people talked about how natural she looked and all that, and I ate three big cookie, then I looked down at my gut and was disgusted because I'm a damn glutton.
	Anyways, two things happened when we all left the funeral home: the first thing was I offered to be a pallbearer. It was my great aunt Margret's viewing, like I said, and my grandma said that me or my brother ought to be pallbearers. My brother's real nervous about some things, one of them is being around dead people. He was afraid he'd drop the casket or something, so I offered to do it, but Margret's niece said no. She told my grandma later that the reason she said no was because I looked like a clown because of my hair. I have long shaggy hair that I dye blood red.
     The second thing is that I noticed the damn Christmas tree in the corner near the door in the lobby -- it's getting close to Christmas now. It was tall and green and decorated in bright white lights and silver tinsel and big red bulbs with the names of all the dead people who were shown there that year written on them with permanent marker. I saw Margret's name in the center.
	I thought it was sort of strange, decorating the tree with the dead. I think that funeral homes are strange altogether. When you die everybody you ever met practically comes and cries and get all sad at the site of your leftover meat.
	When I got back home I started over to my friend Darren's house.
	Darren and I have went to school together since fourth grade, but we just started hanging out this year because we've always ran with different crowds. His friends are the kind of guys that wear gym shorts all year long and lust after Air Jordans and Beats Headphones and try to punk out everybody so they can feel tough. Plus, we've never had any classes together or anything until this year, but Darren's probably my favorite friend.
      The only problem with us hanging out is that he smokes a lot of weed and he's got me smoking a lot too. Last weekend we blew fifteen bucks on weed, smoked it all and stayed up until four listening to The Beatles.
	He's never listened to much music outside of rap, so I've been trying to show him some good stuff. He always acts like he likes it, but he's probably just entertaining me. He's probably just telling me he likes it because we're friends and he's nice. Darren's a real nice sensitive guy under all that wanna-be-thug shit he's always doing. He's nicer than me in a lot of ways, like when he's listening to rap and I don't like it, I tell him and bitch until he turns it off, and when he turns it off, he isn't even mad about having to doing it because he's real considerate. I wish I was that considerate.
	Anyways, Darren and I ended up going down to the cemetery and smoking a fat joint. I told him about the funeral home Christmas tree and he said that the funeral home was retarded.
	"They won't be putting my name on some damn bulb," he said. Then he talked about the rapture through the rest of the cemetery. He told me that we weren't going to have to worry about funerals because we weren't really going to die because we  were going up in the rapture. Darren was always talking about the rapture. He never went to church, but he had all the faith
in the world that the rapture was going to happen at any minute and he had all the faith in the world that the two of us were going.
	He told me once that I'm the only friend he likes to talk to about the rapture. It was probably because I'm the only one
who will even listen. I don't believe in the Bible, but I don't mind talking about Bible stuff if I care about the person doing most of the talking.
	If Heaven exists, Darren will go because he's nice and sensitive. If there's a Heaven, Margret's there because she was a real sweet lady. It's a nice idea, the idea of Heaven, I mean. I guess I'd rather float up to a cloud kingdom than to get old and die and be buried in a boxes.
	Anyways, I'm not sure why he thinks I'm going to Heaven.
	Once we got out of the cemetery, we saw this old tin can in the middle of the street, and the street was empty because it was about nine at night or later and it was cold and everybody besides the two of us were inside around heater and wrap in blankets, probably. Anyways, we started kicking the can down this alley and we kept falling down and laughing because we were stoned.
	We kept on kicking the can down the alleys until I had to piss. I went behind this old white shed, unbuttoned my pants and
unzipped and started pissing. There was this Oldsmobile behind me, it was parked on the other side of the alley, I thought it was empty because it was dark and I couldn't see through the
windows. Well, somebody was in it, and halfway through my piss, whoever it was  beeped the horn and scared me half to death,
 and I ended up pissing down my leg. I zipped up my pants and Darren and I got the hell out of the alley as fast as we could. It was funny, though. I didn't even mind the piss on my leg that much.

title: [UR] Funeral Home Christmas Tree

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about the type of person Darren is?

answer: The story portrays Darren as a sensitive, considerate person. He listens to music his friend finds meaningful, and he is always open to discussing matters of faith and the afterlife. By contrast, the protagonist also recognizes that Darren behaves differently from him: whereas the protagonist is easily irritated, Darren is patient and kind.

answer: Darren is a nice guy who listens to his friend as they share their stories and viewpoints. He's a sensitive guy under all the thug talk, and he's considerate when it comes to his friend's opinions. Darren has all the faith in the world in the rapture, and he believes only those who have a pure heart, such as himself, will make it to heaven. It seems Darren has never tried to go against the temptations he was always exposed to on the streets.

answer: Darren is a kind guy who is sensitive and considerate. He enjoys cannabis and would talk about the rapture. He lacks faith in the church and has strong faith in the Bible and in the rapture.

answer: The story suggests that Darren is a considerate and sensitive person. Despite being of a different crowd and listening to different music, Darren is able to show compassion for others, even in times of hardship. Darren also sees the absurdity in the funeral home Christmas tree, and the two spend time having fun in the cemetery. It is clear that Darren is a kind, sweet person.

answer: Darren smokes a lot of weed. He pretends to like the narrator's music because they're friends and he's nice. He's a sensitive guy under his wannabe-thug persona. He turns off his rap music when the narrator says he doesn't like it, and isn't mad about it because he's considerate. He's always talking about the rapture, even though he never goes to church. The narrator believes that if Heaven exists, Darren would go.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize everything relating to the narrator's family.

answer: The narrator attends the viewing for his great aunt Margret. His grandma said that he or his broughter ought to be pall bearers. Since his brother was afraid of dropping the casket, the narrator offered to do it, but Margret's niece declined. The narrator believes Margret is in Heaven because she was a real sweet lady.

answer: The narrator is related to Margret. He seems to live with their grandmother and brother. Their father lives separately, not being mentioned in this text.

text: The response does not explain that Margret is the protagonist's late great aunt.

refinement: The narrator is related to Margret, his late great aunt. He seems to live with their grandmother and brother. Their father lives separately, not being mentioned in this text.

answer: The narrator's great aunt Margret died, and at her viewing the narrator volunteered to be a pallbearer. There was also a Christmas tree set up in the lobby of the funeral home with names of dead people written on the bulbs. The narrator and Darren went down to the cemetery to smoke a joint, and the oldsmobile parked there scared the narrator while he was urinating. The narrator's family seems to consist mostly of relatives who have passed away.

answer: The narrator's grandma says she says either him or his brother ought to be pallbearers at her great aunt Margret's viewing. They went to the cemetery together to smoke pot and talk about the rapture where the narrator starts kicking a tin can. His friend Darren kept talking about the rapture and they kept talking until they got back and they got in the Olds near the white shed.

text: The last sentence is irrelevant to the narrator's family.

refinement: The narrator's grandma says she says either him or his brother ought to be pallbearers at her great aunt Margret's viewing. They went to the cemetery together to smoke pot and talk about the rapture where the narrator starts kicking a tin can.

answer:
The narrator's great aunt Margret died, and the viewer attendees discussed the body and other mundane topics. The narrator then noticed the funeral home's Christmas tree and found the decorations morbid and strange.

The narrator's family consists of the narrator and their brother, as well as their great aunt Margret. The family is predominantly composed of older people and the narrator's brother is nervous around dead people. Though the narrator considers himself nice, Darren is even nicer. The narrator and Darren got stoned and observed a tin can in the street, and the narrator eventually urinated against a white shed, which caused someone to honk their car horn and scare the narrator. The narrator does not mind the resulting urine on their leg, which is indicative of their generally good-hearted nature.

text: Darren is irrelevant to the narrator's family.

refinement:
The narrator's great aunt Margret died, and the viewer attendees discussed the body and other mundane topics. The narrator then noticed the funeral home's Christmas tree and found the decorations morbid and strange.

The narrator's family consists of the narrator and their brother, as well as their great aunt Margret. The family is predominantly composed of older people and the narrator's brother is nervous around dead people.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the narrator's movements after he meets up with Darren.

answer: After meeting up with his friend Darren, the narrator goes to the cemetery and smokes a joint, then goes for a walk afterward. While walking, the narrator finds a tin can in the street, and as he is peeing behind an empty car, the car's horn is accidentally blown, causing him to piss on himself.

answer: After the narrator and Darren meet, they meet up with his friend at the cemetery to smoke a joint. They walk a bit and when they leave the cemetery, go to kick a tin can back to Darren's place until the narrator needs to go to the bathroom.

text: They did not meet up with another friend.

refinement: After the narrator and Darren meet, they smoke a joint. They walk a bit and when they leave the cemetery, go to kick a tin can back to Darren's place until the narrator needs to go to the bathroom.

answer: The narrator meets with Darren at Darren's house. They go to the cemetery. Once they exit the cemetery, they kick a can down an alley. The narrator goes behind an old white shed to pee. When the narrator realizes there is someone in the car parked on the other side of the alley, he and Darren run away as fast as they can.

text: The response does not mention their activities in the cemetery.

refinement: The narrator meets with Darren at Darren's house. They go to the cemetery and smoke a joint. Once they exit the cemetery, they kick a can down an alley. The narrator goes behind an old white shed to pee. When the narrator realizes there is someone in the car parked on the other side of the alley, he and Darren run away as fast as they can.

answer: The narrator went to Darren's house and smoked a joint together. While walking back from the cemetery, the narrator sees a funeral home Christmas tree and is disturbed by it. After kicking a tin can around an alley, the narrator ends up pissing down his leg when a car honks at him. Despite the pee, the narrator doesn't mind too much.

text: The response does not mention that they smoked in the cemetery.

refinement: The narrator went to Darren's house and smoked a joint together in the cemetery. While walking back from the cemetery, the narrator sees a funeral home Christmas tree and is disturbed by it. After kicking a tin can around an alley, the narrator ends up pissing down his leg when a car honks at him. Despite the pee, the narrator doesn't mind too much.

answer: The two go to a cemetery directly after visiting the funeral home and smoking a joint. Darren convinces the narrator that his drug-use and bad behavior "isn't that bad" while encouraging him to follow in those footsteps. After visiting the cemetery, the two hang out kicking a tin can until the narrator pisses and causes it to fall, causing the narrator to pee himself.


text:
Sinosphere

[Li Tingting posing as Rosie the Riveter to mark the anniversary of her detention with four other feminists on the eve of International Women’s Day. The sign reads: “The full name of ‘Women’s Day’ is ‘International Women’s Labor Day!’ We don’t want your care and concern, we want rights!” Courtesy of Li Tingting]

-   March 7, 2016

BEIJING — Dressed as Rosie the Riveter, the icon of American women’s empowerment during World War II, Li Tingting’s raised fist in a photograph posted on Facebook on Monday signaled defiance — one year after the authorities detained her and four other Chinese feminists on the eve of International Women’s Day, causing an international uproar.

But while the women and their lawyers continue to protest the lack of resolution in the public disorder charges against them, Ms. Li welcomed a victory in a cause that feminists have advocated for more than two decades: China’s first law against domestic violence took effect on March 1.

Taken together, the two issues reflected a society where there is progress even as feminists struggle to advance women’s rights amid tightening restrictions on public advocacy. They also highlight differences between younger and older feminists who share similar goals but may differ in their approach.

On Monday, Ms. Li, 26, also posted a statement sarcastically thanking the Chinese government “for pushing the feminist movement in China to another peak” by detaining the women, and vowing that the women would persist in their cause, despite being “greatly restrained.”

The five women were detained on March 7, 2015, for planning to distribute leaflets the next day warning about groping on public transit. Their case gained traction online with the hashtag #freethefive, embarrassing the Chinese government in a year of official celebrations in New York for the 20th anniversary of the United Nations’ Fourth World Conference on Women, attended by President Xi Jinping of China and his wife, Peng Liyuan.

Ms. Li (also known as Li Maizi), Wang Man, Wei Tingting, Wu Rongrong and Zheng Churan were released on bail after a five-week incarceration that their lawyers said included ill treatment, medical neglect and harassment.

A year later, the charges against them remain, leaving them in legal limbo, their lawyers said. At the end of February, the lawyers issued a joint statement addressed to the Supreme People’s Procuratorate and the National People’s Congress, which is meeting in Beijing, calling the case a miscarriage of justice and asking why the prosecution had not withdrawn it.

“From then until now, not a single legal body of state has answered our questions,” Ge Wenxiu, a lawyer for Ms. Wei, said in an interview.

“This time we’ve sent our statement to the Supreme People’s Procuratorate because, in the Chinese system, investigating the limits to legal activities is done by the procuratorate,” Mr. Ge said.

Advocating feminism “in a mild way,” as others had for decades, had failed, and Chinese feminists needed “a more intense way” to achieve their goals, she wrote on Facebook in English to explain a high-profile approach that began in 2012 and has included actions such as appearing in bloodied bridal gowns, occupying men’s toilets and wearing giant paper underpants.

“Like all the social movements, the Chinese feminist movement has experienced climaxes and bottoms,” Ms. Li wrote. “Although it is greatly restrained at present, we believe that the feminism activists in China will promote it with our wisdom and brave heart.”

For Ms. Li, the new law was an achievement. She welcomed it, though her comments were measured, reflecting perhaps greater impatience and ambition among younger Chinese feminists. For example, many openly lobby for gay rights in a way older generations did not.

“It’s definitely good to have this law,” she said in an interview. She was happy that the law covered cohabiting partners, not just married couples. But she had concerns, including the fact that the law does not clarify whether it also protects same-sex partners.

To older feminists and lawyers who had long campaigned for legal measures against domestic violence, it was important that the “Anti-Family Violence Law” for the first time makes it possible for victims to obtain protection orders from abusers easily and quickly. On March 1, the day it took effect, the first such order was granted, to a Ms. Gu in Beijing whose husband had beaten her for 35 years, the Legal Evening News reported.

For Qi Lianfeng — a lawyer who represented an American woman, Kim Lee, who in 2013 was granted a divorce in Beijing on grounds of abuse by her husband, Li Yang — the law broke ground by defining domestic violence.

“It’s a big help that the law defines domestic violence for the first time,” said Mr. Qi, a lawyer at Beijing Ming Hang Law Firm.

The definition says, “Domestic violence as defined by this law is when people within a family beat, tie up, abuse or limit personal freedoms, or regularly verbally abuse or terrorize, causing physical or mental harm.” It includes violence against women, men, children, the elderly and the disabled.

For Zhang Rongli, a law professor at China Women’s University, the law was “really big progress.”

“In traditional and patriarchal countries like China or India, it’s really big progress that people can be punished for this violence,” she said in an interview.

There had been significant pushback, Ms. Zhang said. Some warned the new law would cause family disharmony.

“Some people are saying it will create problems, for example in the education of children,” she said. Corporal punishment of children is common in China. “Some even say that we’re changing Chinese tradition! This is absurd.”

“People used to have nowhere to go,” Ms. Zhang added. “Now they have protections.”

Ms. Zhang said the government was moving fast to spread word of the law with education and training. She was set to travel to Inner Mongolia soon to train court and police personnel in how to put it into effect, she said.

Some of the measures the lawyers and Ms. Li said the law should have included are those addressing sexual violence in a marriage such as rape, abusive economic control and the denial of medical treatment, “a big problem,” according to Mr. Qi.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about the problems women face in China?

answer: In China, feminists face many challenges, including the fact that they are restricted in the ways they are allowed to advocate, and that the case of five feminists detained during International Women's Day one year ago remains unresolved. Whereas some feminists celebrate progress such as the new domestic violence law, other feminists are concerned about things such as the possibility that the law does not protect same-sex partners, and the fact that the law does not include protection for sexual violence in marriage. Despite these challenges, there is still progress towards achieving women's rights, even as feminists continue to struggle.

answer: The full name of "Women's Day" is "International Women's Labor Day", and that women in China did not have basic rights such as freedom of association, equal pay, and equal protections under the law. The pro-equality movement started in 2012 and increased the feminist activism in China. Thanks to the changes in Beijing, younger feminists could start talking about their rights, including gay rights.

text: The article does not say that women in China do not have rights such as freedom of association, equal pay, and equal protections under the law.

refinement: The full name of "Women's Day" is "International Women's Labor Day". The pro-equality movement started in 2012 and increased the feminist activism in China. Thanks to the changes in Beijing, younger feminists could start talking about their rights, including gay rights.

text: The first sentence is unnecessary.

refinement: The pro-equality movement started in 2012 and increased the feminist activism in China. Thanks to the changes in Beijing, younger feminists could start talking about their rights, including gay rights.

text: The response is missing several key pieces of information, including tightening restrictions on public advocacy, lack of transparency of protections for same-sex couples, and protection against sexual violence.

refinement: The pro-equality movement started in 2012 and increased the feminist activism in China. Thanks to the changes in Beijing, younger feminists could start talking about their rights, including gay rights. However, there are still limits and restrictions on public advocacy as seen with the detention of five women for distributing leaflets. Even under the new domestic violence law, measures to protect against sexual violence are not included in it.

answer:
The article primarily speaks about two issues related to the advancement of women's rights in China: the detention of five women on the eve of International Women's Day, and the enactment of China's first law against domestic violence.

It appears that while there have been some gains in advancing women's rights, including the passage of China's first law against domestic violence, feminists are also facing increasing restrictions in their activities. This has left some feeling frustrated and having concerns about the persistence of violence against women in China.

text: The response should include that the domestic violence law does not clarify whether it protects against same-sex couples, and also does not include protection against sexual violence.

refinement:
The article primarily speaks about two issues related to the advancement of women's rights in China: the detention of five women on the eve of International Women's Day, and the enactment of China's first law against domestic violence.

It appears that while there have been some gains in advancing women's rights, including the passage of China's first law against domestic violence, feminists are also facing increasing restrictions in their activities. This has left some feeling frustrated and having concerns about the persistence of violence against women in China. The law also does not clarify whether or not it protects same-sex couples, and does not protect against sexual violence.

answer: Domestic abuse and violence are big problems. The article talks about physical violence as well as emotional abuse and sexual assault in such cases. The feminist movement faces the authoritarian pushback of the Chinese government despite the progress achieved with the domestic violence law.

text: The highlighted sentence is slightly incoherent and does not explain how the feminist movement is being pushed back.

refinement: Domestic abuse and violence are big problems. The article talks about physical violence as well as emotional abuse and sexual assault in such cases. The feminist movement is restricted action in many ways despite the progress achieved with the domestic violence law, including tightening restrictions on public advocacy.

text: The response should include that even with the passage of the new domestic violence law, it is not clear if same-sex couples are protected, and that sexual violence is not protected either.

refinement: Domestic abuse and violence are big problems. The article talks about physical violence as well as emotional abuse and sexual assault in such cases. The feminist movement is restricted action in many ways despite the progress achieved with the domestic violence law, including tightening restrictions on public advocacy. The new law also does not clarify if it protects same-sex couples, and also does not protect against sexual abuse.

answer: Many decades ago, there was no law that protected women against domestic violence, until the Chinese government created a law in 2015. It removed the need for physical evidence for the abusers, and also increased women's political rights. Women are now able to report abuse directly from their family members, and because of that, the law completely changed the traditional way the Chinese government worked.

text: The entire response does not answer the question.

refinement: The article primarily speaks about two issues related to the advancement of women's rights in China: the detention of five women on the eve of International Women's Day, and the enactment of China's first law against domestic violence. It appears that while there have been some gains in advancing women's rights, including the passage of China's first law against domestic violence, feminists are also facing increasing restrictions in their activities. This has left some feeling frustrated and having concerns about the persistence of violence against women in China. The law also does not clarify whether or not it protects same-sex couples, and does not protect against sexual violence.


text:
Footsteps echo in the long stone corridor. Small chains can also be heard. The man is panting, running towards a wooden door with golden engravings. He rams in the door, forgetting about the doorknob. The door hits the Jester, who then falls to the ground and breaks his nose. In the middle of the room, is the leader. Without wasting an instant, he yells

“Sire! We are under attack!” Yells the Subreddit knight.
“What?” Screams the leader, standing up
“Yes sire! Castle Repost is breaching our walls! It won't be long now!”
“What are they after?”
“The same thing as always, they wish to break Castle AdviceAnimal's walls and reach the Front Page fortress!”
“This shouldn't be a problem, our Downvote cannons are always charged! Tell me what happened!”
“They managed to outnumber us. They silently shot down our defenses with their Upvote Cannons. From that point, they burned the front gate and slowly walked in.”
“Where are they now?” Asks the Leader
“We managed to arm our comment guns and slow them down, but soon they will overpower us.” The knight explained
“Did you try calling on an ally Castle? Like Castle Funny or Castle Aww?”
“We did, but they said they could not arrive for a few days. We sent messages to Castle Atheist and Circle-Jerk, we have no response yet, but I'm sure they will refuse.”
“What about the citizens?”

A cannon shot is heard, then a smashing sound. Screams flood the air, followed by another explosion and screams of glory.

“We tried to make them leave by the secret tunnels, but many citizens took to arms and jumped into the fight. Many died and are still dying. The ones that decided to escape found that most of the tunnels were blocked. We lost many.” Explains the Knight, a hint of sadness in his voice.
“How many men do we have left?”
“When I left, a few were still standing. A few of our men have been captured and enslaved. The Fortress was still untouched, but, as we heard, that has changed.”
“Then follow me, we shall gather what few we have and craft some plan that might turn the table.” Commands the King.

The King opens the door. A few cats run away from the room. The Jester stands up and runs to the corridor, where a cannonball smashes through and hits him. The Knight goes first, but turns left. The King follows him. They walk through the stone corridors and passageways, on their way seeing the Castle Nobles running awry. The Scumbag Brain is hitting a door, trying to get in, while the Scumbag Steve and Stacy are pushing people aside, running in circles. As the Knight and King finally arrive to the armory, they realize that it's completely empty.

“Where are they all?” Asks the King
“At the walls, fighting off the enemy. We were lucky not to encounter them.”
More screams are heard, this time closer to them. Again, the same victory cries are heard.

“We don't have any time left. The enemy is here, searching for me. We have to act now.”
“All the weapons we have left are here. A few pounds of black powder, some swords and dagger and two shields.” Counts the Knight, as he locks the door.

The King walks and sits in a corner. As he does this, the door blasts open in a cloud of fire, smoke and blood. The King screams as portions of his newest friend splatters his robes. As the smoke dies down, an orange arrow smashes into the wall next to his head.

“So, you managed to outlive all of your little guards? No matter, you will join them soon enough.” A voice chuckles.
“So you are the new general that managed to recruit all of these newbies? You are new yourself, but competent.” Tells the King.
“Why thank you, but don't think complements will save you. I am here on a mission.” Exclaims the General
“You are competent, but still inexperienced. Exactly like your army.”  Explains the King
“And why is that?” Asks the General
“Because you didn't think this through. The worst place to be when you attack a Fortress, especially when you confront someone, is the armory.” Slowly says the King
“Explain.” Demands the General
“Let me show you.” The King says

The General and his army intensely stares at the King, while he reaches into his back pocket with his left hand. He slowly pulls out a gun.

“Downvote gun, one of the most powerful ever built” Says the King.
“Don't even think about shooting me or yourself.” Confidently says the General.

The King lets out a little laugh. He slowly points the muzzle to his left. The entire audience looks left, over to a pile of swords and daggers. As fast as he can, the King takes a shield and shoots to his right, on a pile of black powder. As the audience looks right, they see a large flash of light, then another ball of fire, smoke and blood fill the room. Screams are heard, but no victory cries are heard this time. When the smoke falls, the King uncurls from behind the shield and stands up.

“Time to rebuild, again... Will these attacks ever end?” He sighs

As he walks out of the room, he looks at all the damage done to the Fortress and the Kingdom. A cat walks to him and starts cuddling.

- “I really need a bath.” He whispers.

title: The attack of the Repost

question: What does the story depict?

text: No answer.

text: No answer.

answer: It's a meta-commentary about the neverending struggle between re-posters and moderators on Reddit.

text: The story uses Reddit terms and personifies and objectifies them to create a narrative that represents the issue given in the answer.

question: How does the General gets defeated?

answer: His side's re-posts are downvoted to death.

text: The answer should be more specific.

refinement: The General is defeated by the King, who blows up the General's army with a powerful downvote gun.

text: The King lets out a little laugh. He slowly points the muzzle to his left. The entire audience looks left, over to a pile of swords and daggers. As fast as he can, the King takes a shield and shoots to his right, on a pile of black powder. As the audience looks right, they see a large flash of light, then another ball of fire, smoke and blood fill the room. Screams are heard, but no victory cries are heard this time. When the smoke falls, the King uncurls from behind the shield and stands up.

answer: The King uses a downvote gun to turn two piles of weapons on the General and his army. He shoots at the right one and covers his figure behind the left one. His shield deflects the ball of fire, but it also blocks him from shooting at the powder at the left. A part of the fallen General after the explosion.

text:
The answer doesn't make sense for example: 'A part of the fallen General after the explosion.'
This requires an significant edit.

refinement: The King uses a downvote gun on the General and his army. He shoots at black powder to his right and raises a shield. The shield deflects the ball of fire, which obliterates the General and his army.

text: The King lets out a little laugh. He slowly points the muzzle to his left. The entire audience looks left, over to a pile of swords and daggers. As fast as he can, the King takes a shield and shoots to his right, on a pile of black powder. As the audience looks right, they see a large flash of light, then another ball of fire, smoke and blood fill the room. Screams are heard, but no victory cries are heard this time. When the smoke falls, the King uncurls from behind the shield and stands up.

answer: He chooses to go to the empty armory, one of the worst places to be in a fortress.

text: The answer mentions the General's mistake, but not the full explanation of the King's part in his defeat.

refinement: He chooses to go to the empty armory, one of the worst places to be in a fortress. The King, who leads him here, explodes a pile of black powder and obliterates the general and is army.

question: Why did so many citizens die?

answer: They jump into fight between Subreddit Knight and the Castle which is currently under attack.

text: The answer could be more accurate to the information given in the story.

refinement: They take up arms against the invading army, and those who tried to escape became trapped in the tunnels

text: “We tried to make them leave by the secret tunnels, but many citizens took to arms and jumped into the fight. Many died and are still dying. The ones that decided to escape found that most of the tunnels were blocked. We lost many.”

answer: They decided to join the fight instead of fleeing.

text: The answer should mention those who tried to escape too.

refinement: They decided to join the fight instead of fleeing, and those who try to escape are trapped in the tunnels.

text: “We tried to make them leave by the secret tunnels, but many citizens took to arms and jumped into the fight. Many died and are still dying. The ones that decided to escape found that most of the tunnels were blocked. We lost many.”

answer: One possible reason is that it makes perfect sense that when someone hears there is a chance of danger they would want to defend their home grounds. Lines in the story like “they knew this would be very bloody; the knights and the civilians were all seasoned in battle while the enemy were full of memes and worst of all, new blood” suggests that the side from outside isn’t interested in playing a fair game - they want to overwhelm and sue their numbers instead of strategy.

text: There is a clear answer, so no need for supposition such as: One possible reason is that it makes perfect sense that when someone hears there is a chance of danger they would want to defend their home grounds.

refinement: Many civilians were killed when they took up arms, those who tried to escape became trapped in the blocked tunnels.

text: We tried to make them leave by the secret tunnels, but many citizens took to arms and jumped into the fight. Many died and are still dying. The ones that decided to escape found that most of the tunnels were blocked. We lost many.”

question: Why is the armory empty?

answer: Everyone is on the walls, fighting the enemy.

text:
“Where are they all?” Asks the King
“At the walls, fighting off the enemy. We were lucky not to encounter them.”

answer: In this story, it is clear that the armory is empty because it is the most vulnerable and dangerous place to be during a siege. With little weapons and no allies available, once the attackers realized the armory was empty, it was quickly overrun.

text: The answer is simple and stated in the story, there is no need for supposition.

refinement: The armory is empty due to the fact that everyone is on the walls, fighting off te enemy.

text:
“Where are they all?” Asks the King
“At the walls, fighting off the enemy. We were lucky not to encounter them.”

answer: The armory is empty because everyone is fighting off the attacking army, which means they couldn't make it to safety. Without weapons and supplies, the King is able to easily wound or even kill the approaching army.

text: 'Without weapons and supplies, the King is able to easily wound or even kill the approaching army.' is unnecessary.

refinement: The armory is empty because everyone is fighting off the attacking army, which means they couldn't make it to safety.

text: 'which means they couldn't make it to safety.' is unnecessary.

refinement: The armory is empty because everyone is fighting off the attacking army at the walls.

text:
“Where are they all?” Asks the King
“At the walls, fighting off the enemy. We were lucky not to encounter them.”
More screams are heard, this time closer to them. Again, the same victory cries are heard.

question: Write a ~6 sentence summary.

answer: Castle Repost and the Kingdom of AdviceAnimal are facing an oncoming assault of Castle AdviceAnimal. A Knight runs to the King of Castle AdviceAnimal with news of the attack. The Knight tells the King that Castle Repost has outnumbered them and has breached the walls with it's Upvote Cannons, forcing the King to have made the Knight run for safety. Castle AdviceAnimal has sent out messages to every Castle that can help, but none can arrive in time for the current attack. During their search for weapons for battle, the King quietly pulls out a Downvote gun and kills the General as he came through the door. The King challenges the account that the general takes such a gamble by throwing all of his men at the King instead of getting the King in a more private space. The King says he needs a bath.

text: 7 sentences instead of 6 or less.

refinement: Castle Repost and the Kingdom of AdviceAnimal are facing an oncoming assault of Castle AdviceAnimal. A Knight runs to the King of Castle AdviceAnimal with news of the attack. The Knight tells the King that Castle Repost has outnumbered them and has breached the walls with it's Upvote Cannons, forcing the King to have made the Knight run for safety. Castle AdviceAnimal has sent out messages to every Castle that can help, but none can arrive in time for the current attack. During their search for weapons for battle, the King quietly pulls out a Downvote gun and kills the General as he came through the door. The King challenges the account that the general takes such a gamble by throwing all of his men at the King instead of getting the King in a more private space.

text: Details are incorrect such as 'The King quietly pulls out a downvote gun and kills the General as he comes through the door'

refinement: Castle Repost and the Kingdom of AdviceAnimal are facing an oncoming assault of Castle AdviceAnimal. A Knight runs to the King of Castle AdviceAnimal with news of the attack. The Knight tells the King that Castle Repost has outnumbered them and has breached the walls with it's Upvote Cannons. Castle AdviceAnimal has sent out messages to every Castle that can help, but none can arrive in time to help. During their search for weapons for battle, the King lures the General and his men to the armory, where he kills them in an explosion. The King decides he needs a bath

text:
“Sire! We are under attack!” Yells the Subreddit knight.
“What?” Screams the leader, standing up
“Yes sire! Castle Repost is breaching our walls! It won't be long now!”
“What are they after?”
“The same thing as always, they wish to break Castle AdviceAnimal's walls and reach the Front Page fortress!”

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“We don't have any time left. The enemy is here, searching for me. We have to act now.”
“All the weapons we have left are here. A few pounds of black powder, some swords and dagger and two shields.” Counts the Knight, as he locks the door.

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Because you didn't think this through. The worst place to be when you attack a Fortress, especially when you confront someone, is the armory.” Slowly says the King
“Explain.” Demands the General

answer: The Subreddit Knight yells for the King to get up, Castle Repost has breached Castle AdviceAnimal's walls. The King yells back that they shouldn't be a problem and asks the knight what his plan is. The Knight says they tried to make the citizens leave by the secret tunnels but many stayed to fight. They lost many. The king's men cluster together in the armory, where they're outnumbered. The king uses a downvoter gun to kill the general.

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Details incorrect:
The King stands up once warned, the Knight doesn't yell for him to 'get up'.
The King goes to the armory with the Knight who is killed, not clustered with his men.
The King yells back that they shouldn't be a problem and asks the knight what his plan is - The King is given a rundown of events by the Knight.

refinement: The Subreddit Knight informs the King Castle Repost has breached Castle AdviceAnimal's walls. The knight explains the situation and says that they tried to make the citizens leave by the secret tunnels but many stayed to fight.  The king retreats to the armory with The Knight, he then uses a downvoter gun to kill the General.

answer: After a mighty cannonball blast, a subeditor knight runs into the throne room describing how the enemy is attacking the castle. He tells the king how the enemy shot down the guard's defenses and is slowly approaching the fortress. The knight's King's castle fell to the enemy but they got reinforcements. They were not expecting to see the king still alive after all his guards have been slain. They had hid in the armory but weren't there for long as the enemy ambushed them. The knight fends off an arrow and sends one back, killing the enemy general.

text: The summary requires a grammatical/spelling tidy-up, for example 'subeditor' should be 'Subreddit'

refinement: After a mighty cannonball blast, a Subreddit knight runs into the throne room and tells the King that the enemy is attacking the castle. He tells the king how the enemy shot down the guard's defenses and is slowly approaching the fortress. The King's Castle falls and the King retreats to the armoury. They were not expecting to see the king still alive after all his guards were slain. They hid in the armory but weren't there for long as the enemy ambushed them. The knight fends off an arrow and sends one back, killing the enemy general.

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refinement: After a mighty cannonball blast, a Subreddit knight runs into the throne room and tells the King that the enemy is attacking the castle. The Knight tells the King how the enemy shot down the castle's defenses and are slowly encroaching on the fortress. As the castle falls, the King and the Knight hide in the armory where the enemy General finds them. The King uses a downvoter gun to blow up black powder, obliterating the General and his men.

answer: A gunman goes to the repost king, yelling that Castle Repost breached Castle AdviceAnimal's walls. It is clear the castle needs help. The blood flows and we see explosions and bodies littering the floor. The forces meet, and a gun goes off. The blood of one of the leaders flies through the room. Bullets connect and the jesters rush forward.

text: Removal of incorrect information necessary: Bullets connect and the jesters rush forward.

refinement: A gunman goes to the repost king, yelling that Castle Repost breached Castle AdviceAnimal's walls. It is clear the castle needs help. The blood flows and we see explosions and bodies littering the floor. The forces meet, and a gun goes off. The blood of one of the leaders flies through the room.

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Details needs to be cleared up:
The forces meet, and a gun goes off. The blood of one of the leaders flies through the room.

refinement: A gunman goes to the repost king, yelling that Castle Repost breached Castle AdviceAnimal's walls. It is clear the castle needs help, but none is coming.  The King retreats to the armory with The Knight who is killed when teh General and his men breach the door. The King kills the Genera and his men with a downvote gun and black powder, shielding himself from the blast.

answer: The attack on the castle begins with an uppity as the enemy outnumbers the defenders. The lowly Subreddit knights rush into the battle. The current leader is mildly overwhelmed by the events. They are prepared for everything in the armory, waiting for the enemy's approach. An old enemy and incompetent general ends up surprising the castle and kills the king.

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Nonsensical and incorrect terms need to be replaced.

'The attack on the castle begins with an uppity'
'The current leader is mildly overwhelmed by the events.'
'An old enemy and incompetent general ends up surprising the castle and kills the king.'

refinement: The Subreddit Knight warns the King of AdviceAnimal Castle that they are under attack. The King is overwhelmed by the events as recounted by the Knight. They rush to the armory for safety and wait for the enemy's approach. The Knight is killed as the enemy breaches the door and the King banters with the General before killing him and his men with a powerful downvote gun.

answer: The Subreddit Knight runs to the King, yelling that they are under attack. He explains that Castle Repost is breaching their walls. The King asks about allies, but no one is available. They run to the armory together. An explosion kills the Subreddit Knight, and the King faces the General of the opposition. After a bit of banter, the King uses his downvote gun to get rid of the opposition.

text: Unecessary sentence: They run to the armory together.

refinement: The Subreddit Knight runs to the King, yelling that they are under attack. He explains that Castle Repost is breaching their walls. The King asks about allies, but no one is available. They hide in the armory but an explosion kills the Subreddit Knight. The King faces the General of the opposition and, after a bit of banter, the King uses his downvote gun to get obliterate the opposition.

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“Sire! We are under attack!” Yells the Subreddit knight.
“What?” Screams the leader, standing up

text: “Yes sire! Castle Repost is breaching our walls! It won't be long now!”

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“Did you try calling on an ally Castle? Like Castle Funny or Castle Aww?”
“We did, but they said they could not arrive for a few days.

text: The King screams as portions of his newest friend splatters his robes.

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“You are competent, but still inexperienced. Exactly like your army.” Explains the King
“And why is that?” Asks the General
“Because you didn't think this through. The worst place to be when you attack a Fortress, especially when you confront someone, is the armory.” Slowly says the King
“Explain.” Demands the General
“Let me show you.” The King says