text:
“Just a few questions sir, and we’ll be out of your hair” said the neatly kept woman behind the desk.

“No problem”, Pete replied, wondering how she fell into this job.

“Okay then, so. Age?”

“25”, he said, after a brief pause that someone lying might have needed.  She nodded, punching the keyboard twice.

“Weight?”

“Ooo, God knows. Sorry. I mean, I have no idea.  The last time I weighed myself I was about 210, 220? But that was at least a month ago.” He turned to his side. “What do you reckon?”  She smiled, embarrassed at his gesture.

“We’ll say 210 then.” Pete congratulated himself, then thanked her for the accidental compliment.

“Time of death?” asked the woman, slightly more sternly then the last questions.  Pete was taken aback.  He was having fun before that one.

“Don’t you already know that?” he asked.  She shrugged sympathetically. “It’s for our records.”

“Fine. Suicide.” A subtle wince brushed over her face at his brisk retort.  “Will that be a problem?” he asked, noticing her expression.

“No, no absolutely not”.  The woman made a conscious effort to force a smile.  Peter smiled back, her smile was convincing enough.  She had lovely teeth, too.  “If you’d like to go through, Jon will show you around.”

As the words came out of her mouth, a polished, white door opened to the right of her desk.  Jon, who looked like he had stepped out of a shaving advert, was waiting on the other side, doing his best to make him feel as welcome as possible with a beaming smile.  “Come through my friend!” he shouted enthusiastically.  Peter didn’t like him already.

He stepped through the door, not pausing to consider the fact that one of life’s biggest questions was soon going to be answered for him. Of course, he had preconceptions of what heaven might look like – clouds, cherubs, wispy structures with thrones and columns - but he decided he would leave those in the waiting room.   They were mostly taken from Disney’s Hercules anyway; a dubious source at best.

With his jaw hung open, he pivoted on the spot, like a netball player desperately searching for a pass.  The door behind him had disappeared, and surrounding him, in every direction, were rows, and rows, and rows, of cubicles.  They seemed to go on infinitely into the distance, punctuated by a medium sized houseplant by the doorway of each one, and a water cooler every 50 yards in the corridors dissecting them.  He looked at Jon, who was looking around in gleeful awe, as though he too was seeing it for the first time.  “Isn’t it amazing” he said, breaking from his trance to gage Peter’s reaction.

“It’s…an office?”, though it was more of an observation then a question.

“This is what we call The Mothership” explained Jon, still baring those suspiciously white teeth.  “It’s the central hub. The engine room, if you like. This is where you’ll be working.”

title: Heaven is a place on Earth - Part 1

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about where Pete is in the context of heaven and hell?

answer: Since Pete's death was by way of suicide, it is safe to conclude that he is in Hell. Suicide victims can't go to heaven and are forever damned, according to the Bible. Also, Hell is said to be endless repetition, as evidenced in the seemingly never-ending rows of cubicles Pete saw on the other side. One can assume that Pete will be doing the same boring task over and over again for eternity. Lastly, the two other characters Pete encountered had suspiciously white teeth.

text: Not sure what the white teeth say about Pete's destination.

refinement: Since Pete's death was by way of suicide, it is safe to conclude that he is in Hell. Suicide victims can't go to heaven and are forever damned, according to the Bible. Also, Hell is said to be an endless repetition, as evidenced in the seemingly never-ending rows of cubicles Pete saw on the other side. One can assume that Pete will be doing the same boring task over and over again for eternity.

answer: No answer

text: No answer

refinement: Since Pete's death was by way of suicide, it is safe to conclude that he is in Hell. Suicide victims can't go to heaven and are forever damned, according to the Bible. Also, Hell is said to be an endless repetition, as evidenced in the seemingly never-ending rows of cubicles Pete saw on the other side. One can assume that Pete will be doing the same boring task over and over again for eternity.

answer: The story implies that Pete is in heaven because he is in an office-like setting full of cubicles.

text: Not my idea of heaven, but maybe for some!

refinement: The story implies that Pete is in heaven because he is in an office-like setting full of cubicles..

category_text: This is a difficult one to rate since the answer cannot be rated as incorrect.

answer: The passage gives no indication of where in heaven or hell Pete is. It is merely an account of Pete's confusion and wonderment upon walking into an office which is supposedly in heaven.

answer: Pete and the people who work in heaven all dress in white, while the devils dress in black. He has cut a deal with the devil to appear to die, after which Pete leaves his body, ascends to heaven, and completes his list of people to apologise to, which is what he's fascinated about. He thinks about his ways and the ways of his father, the former of whom killed himself probably in shame of something. Pete's body (the physical vessel in which the person lives) is now inhabited by a devil.

text: Very inventive but wholly inaccurate

refinement: Since Pete's death was by way of suicide, it is safe to conclude that he is in Hell. Suicide victims can't go to heaven and are forever damned, according to the Bible. Also, Hell is said to be an endless repetition, as evidenced in the seemingly never-ending rows of cubicles Pete saw on the other side. One can assume that Pete will be doing the same boring task over and over again for eternity.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about Pete?

answer: Pete is a 25 year old man. His heart rate was 55 and he self-declared his weight. Pete perished from suicide. Pete was greeted by a man named Jon who looked like he just stepped out of a shaving ad. Jon is being voiced to be the manager of heaven.

text: The story says nothing about his heart rate and since he is dead it is likely that his heart has stopped.

refinement: Pete is a 25-year-old man. He has self-declared his weight as between 210 and 220. Pete perished from suicide. Pete was greeted by a man named Jon who looked like he just stepped out of a shaving ad. Jon is being voiced to be the manager of heaven.

text: John appears to be the manager of heaven or is it hell?

refinement: Pete is a 25-year-old man. He has self-declared his weight as between 210 and 220. Pete perished from suicide. Pete was greeted by a man named Jon who looked like he just stepped out of a shaving ad. Jon appears to be the manager of heaven.

answer: Pete is confused by the environment he finds himself in. He does not expect an office environment in what he thought would be heaven, and finds Jon's enthusiasm off-putting. Pete sees the environment as strange and uninspired.

text: This lacks relevant information

refinement: Pete is a 25-year-old man who has just committed suicide. He is confused by the environment he finds himself in. He does not expect an office environment in what he thought would be heaven, and finds Jon's enthusiasm off-putting. Pete sees the environment as strange and uninspired.

answer: Pete or Peter, is 25 years old, although he might have been lying about his age. He weighs around 210 - 220 pounds and is either of the right height for his weight, or grossly overweight. Pete died from suicide. He is in the waiting room of, presumably, Hell (because he died of suicide) and is being interviewed by a woman "or records purposes" before he steps over to the other side.

text: Spelling error

refinement: Pete or Peter, is 25 years old, although he might have been lying about his age. He weighs around 210 - 220 pounds and is either of the right height for his weight, or grossly overweight. Pete died from suicide. He is in the waiting room of, presumably, Hell (because he died of suicide) and is being interviewed by a woman "for records purposes" before he steps over to the other side.

answer: Pete is shocked to find that heaven is just a mundane office building. Pete is clearly surprised, disbelieving, and extremely curious, but ultimately unimpressed by what he finds. Pete comes across as skeptical and doubtful.

text: The answer misses some critical information

refinement: Pete is a 25-year-old man who has just committed suicide. He is shocked to find that heaven is just a mundane office building. Pete is clearly surprised, disbelieving, and extremely curious, but ultimately unimpressed by what he finds. Pete comes across as skeptical and doubtful.

answer: Pete is eager to enter Heaven. He is kind and easygoing. Pete responds to playful banter in a playful way. He is deeply affected by suicide. He is surprised to be admitted to Heaven intact instead of being disassembled and reconstructed before admission. He was a jovial, fun person to be around in life and in the story. He is a non-believer, who seems to be on a waiting list. Pete does not expect to like Heaven based on old media misconceptions about what it is and what it should look like.

text: Very inventive, but largely inaccurate

refinement: Pete is eager to enter Heaven. He is 25 and has just committed suicide. Pete ideas of Heaven may be based on old media misconceptions about what it is and what it should look like.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about the other characters in the story not named Pete?

answer: The other characters in the story are primarily assumed to be part of the office or "The Mothership"; they all work there and presumably welcome Pete with open arms. The characters are all depicted as excited about the work or their role in the office, with an implicit sense of joy and satisfaction. Appearances suggest that the characters who work in the office are happy in their work and fascinated by their environment.

text: There is some repetition yet no explicit descriptions of the other characters

refinement: Pete is greeted by a neatly dressed receptionist who is friendly and stern as required. When Pete is finished with her questions, he is greeted by Jon, who looked like he had just stepped out of a shaving advert. He is friendly and enthusiastic and Pete already doesn't like him. He has suspiciously white teeth.

answer: The woman who interviewed Pete in the waiting room had a neatly kept appearance. She seems nice and sympathetic, but stern when she needs to. Jon was the guy that showed Pete around. He looks like a model, complete with a beaming smile. Jon is enthusiastic about welcoming Pete and about his job. Both Jon and the woman have lovely teeth, though Jon's teeth are suspiciously white.

answer: Pete and the neatly-kept woman are the only two named characters in the story. Pete thinks the woman is trying to get a job that she's unfit and unsuited for taking, and she is embarrassed because of Pete's gesture.

text: This is made up.

refinement:
Pete is greeted by a nearly dressed receptionist who is friendly and stern as required. When Pete is finished with the questionnaire he is greeted by Jon, who looked like he had just stepped out of a shaving advert. He is friendly
and enthusiastic and Pete already doesn't like him. He has suspiciously white teeth.

answer:
The story mentions a woman at a desk, whose workplace is Pete's first glimpse of the afterlife. She asks a series of questions for her records and types the answers in a computer about Pete. Like Pete, she also has lovely teeth.

Pete feels no need to take time for thought about what lies through the door. However, he hesitates for a moment to consider the possibilities of an office receptionist, eager to guide him around the place. He instead wants to be introduced straight to his actual job, the main task that his whole career was leading to.

Jon, Pete believed, was already in heaven because he was shiny white. Jon is just waiting behind a door saying "Come through my friend!" Pete still hadn't made assumptions of what heaven looked like. Peter doesn't like him already. He said that they call the place the Mothership and that they call the place the central hub. Jon had hoped there would be drinks of water and coffee - in the real world, these addictions were in heaven as well.

text: The story says nothing about Pete's teeth.

refinement:
The story mentions a woman at a desk, whose workplace is Pete's first glimpse of the afterlife. She asks a series of questions for her records and types the answers in a computer about Pete.

Pete feels no need to take time for thought about what lies through the door. However, he hesitates for a moment to consider the possibilities of an office receptionist, eager to guide him around the place. He instead wants to be introduced straight to his actual job, the main task that his whole career was leading to.

Jon, Pete believed, was already in heaven because he was shiny white. Jon is just waiting behind a door saying "Come through my friend!" Pete still hadn't made assumptions of what heaven looked like. Peter doesn't like him already. He said that they call the place the Mothership and that they call the place the central hub. Jon had hoped there would be drinks of water and coffee - in the real world, these addictions were in heaven as well.

text: The question explicitly excludes Pete from the answer. This answer while not required is also inaccurate.

refinement:
The story mentions a woman at a desk, whose workplace is Pete's first glimpse of the afterlife. She asks a series of questions for her records and types the answers in a computer about Pete.

Jon, Pete believed, was already in heaven because he was shiny white. Jon is just waiting behind a door saying "Come through my friend!" Pete still hadn't made assumptions of what heaven looked like. Peter doesn't like him already. He said that they call the place the Mothership and that they call the place the central hub. Jon had hoped there would be drinks of water and coffee - in the real world, these addictions were in heaven as well.

text: This is made up and inaccurate. Jon lives in heaven he should know what they do up there.

refinement:
The story mentions a woman at a desk, whose workplace is Pete's first glimpse of the afterlife. She asks a series of questions for her records and types the answers in a computer about Pete.

Jon, Pete believed, was already in heaven because he was shiny white. Jon is just waiting behind a door saying "Come through my friend!" Pete still hadn't made assumptions of what heaven looked like. Peter doesn't like him already. He said that they call the place the Mothership and that they call the place the central hub.

text: Unnecessary and confusing

refinement:
The story mentions a woman at a desk, whose workplace is Pete's first glimpse of the afterlife. She asks a series of questions for her records and types the answers in a computer about Pete.

Jon, Pete believed, was already in heaven because he was shiny white. Jon is just waiting behind a door saying "Come through my friend!" Pete still hadn't made assumptions of what heaven looked like. Peter doesn't like him already.

text: Pete may believe he is in heaven but it is because the woman told him that committing suicide wasn't a problem.

refinement:
The story mentions a woman at a desk, whose workplace is Pete's first glimpse of the afterlife. She asks a series of questions for her records and types the answers in a computer about Pete.

Jon is just waiting behind a door saying "Come through my friend!" Pete still hadn't made assumptions of what heaven looked like. Peter doesn't like him already.

answer: From the descriptions of the other characters in the story, it seems that the woman at the desk, Jon, and the rows of cubicles make up heaven. The woman, Jon, and the cubicles all seem to be supporting roles meant to help Pete find his way around his new afterlife. The woman and Jon both seem to want to put Pete at ease, which implies a welcoming vibe overall in heaven.


split: train

text:
     It's funny how people act in the coffee rooms at funeral homes. They're all sad or they act sad out of respect. They all drink coffee and eat the cookies that they put out on the table, and they talk about how the body looks for a while, then they start talking about politics or the weather or some damn boring thing. It happens at every viewing I've ever been to. I even do it. I sat there the other night at my great aunts viewing and I nodded my head when people talked about how natural she looked and all that, and I ate three big cookie, then I looked down at my gut and was disgusted because I'm a damn glutton.
	Anyways, two things happened when we all left the funeral home: the first thing was I offered to be a pallbearer. It was my great aunt Margret's viewing, like I said, and my grandma said that me or my brother ought to be pallbearers. My brother's real nervous about some things, one of them is being around dead people. He was afraid he'd drop the casket or something, so I offered to do it, but Margret's niece said no. She told my grandma later that the reason she said no was because I looked like a clown because of my hair. I have long shaggy hair that I dye blood red.
     The second thing is that I noticed the damn Christmas tree in the corner near the door in the lobby -- it's getting close to Christmas now. It was tall and green and decorated in bright white lights and silver tinsel and big red bulbs with the names of all the dead people who were shown there that year written on them with permanent marker. I saw Margret's name in the center.
	I thought it was sort of strange, decorating the tree with the dead. I think that funeral homes are strange altogether. When you die everybody you ever met practically comes and cries and get all sad at the site of your leftover meat.
	When I got back home I started over to my friend Darren's house.
	Darren and I have went to school together since fourth grade, but we just started hanging out this year because we've always ran with different crowds. His friends are the kind of guys that wear gym shorts all year long and lust after Air Jordans and Beats Headphones and try to punk out everybody so they can feel tough. Plus, we've never had any classes together or anything until this year, but Darren's probably my favorite friend.
      The only problem with us hanging out is that he smokes a lot of weed and he's got me smoking a lot too. Last weekend we blew fifteen bucks on weed, smoked it all and stayed up until four listening to The Beatles.
	He's never listened to much music outside of rap, so I've been trying to show him some good stuff. He always acts like he likes it, but he's probably just entertaining me. He's probably just telling me he likes it because we're friends and he's nice. Darren's a real nice sensitive guy under all that wanna-be-thug shit he's always doing. He's nicer than me in a lot of ways, like when he's listening to rap and I don't like it, I tell him and bitch until he turns it off, and when he turns it off, he isn't even mad about having to doing it because he's real considerate. I wish I was that considerate.
	Anyways, Darren and I ended up going down to the cemetery and smoking a fat joint. I told him about the funeral home Christmas tree and he said that the funeral home was retarded.
	"They won't be putting my name on some damn bulb," he said. Then he talked about the rapture through the rest of the cemetery. He told me that we weren't going to have to worry about funerals because we weren't really going to die because we  were going up in the rapture. Darren was always talking about the rapture. He never went to church, but he had all the faith
in the world that the rapture was going to happen at any minute and he had all the faith in the world that the two of us were going.
	He told me once that I'm the only friend he likes to talk to about the rapture. It was probably because I'm the only one
who will even listen. I don't believe in the Bible, but I don't mind talking about Bible stuff if I care about the person doing most of the talking.
	If Heaven exists, Darren will go because he's nice and sensitive. If there's a Heaven, Margret's there because she was a real sweet lady. It's a nice idea, the idea of Heaven, I mean. I guess I'd rather float up to a cloud kingdom than to get old and die and be buried in a boxes.
	Anyways, I'm not sure why he thinks I'm going to Heaven.
	Once we got out of the cemetery, we saw this old tin can in the middle of the street, and the street was empty because it was about nine at night or later and it was cold and everybody besides the two of us were inside around heater and wrap in blankets, probably. Anyways, we started kicking the can down this alley and we kept falling down and laughing because we were stoned.
	We kept on kicking the can down the alleys until I had to piss. I went behind this old white shed, unbuttoned my pants and
unzipped and started pissing. There was this Oldsmobile behind me, it was parked on the other side of the alley, I thought it was empty because it was dark and I couldn't see through the
windows. Well, somebody was in it, and halfway through my piss, whoever it was  beeped the horn and scared me half to death,
 and I ended up pissing down my leg. I zipped up my pants and Darren and I got the hell out of the alley as fast as we could. It was funny, though. I didn't even mind the piss on my leg that much.

title: [UR] Funeral Home Christmas Tree

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about the type of person Darren is?

answer: The story portrays Darren as a sensitive, considerate person. He listens to music his friend finds meaningful, and he is always open to discussing matters of faith and the afterlife. By contrast, the protagonist also recognizes that Darren behaves differently from him: whereas the protagonist is easily irritated, Darren is patient and kind.

answer: Darren is a nice guy who listens to his friend as they share their stories and viewpoints. He's a sensitive guy under all the thug talk, and he's considerate when it comes to his friend's opinions. Darren has all the faith in the world in the rapture, and he believes only those who have a pure heart, such as himself, will make it to heaven. It seems Darren has never tried to go against the temptations he was always exposed to on the streets.

text: The last sentence made little sense in the context of the whole response.

refinement: Darren is a nice guy who listens to his friend as they share their stories and viewpoints. He's a sensitive guy under all the thug talk, and he's considerate when it comes to his friend's opinions. Darren has all the faith in the world in the rapture, and he believes only those who have a pure heart, such as himself, will make it to heaven.

answer: Darren is a kind guy who is sensitive and considerate. He enjoys cannabis and would talk about the rapture. He lacks faith in the church and has strong faith in the Bible and in the rapture.

answer: The story suggests that Darren is a considerate and sensitive person. Despite being of a different crowd and listening to different music, Darren is able to show compassion for others, even in times of hardship. Darren also sees the absurdity in the funeral home Christmas tree, and the two spend time having fun in the cemetery. It is clear that Darren is a kind, sweet person.

text: The last sentence is a view shared mostly by the narrator as it seems Darren does bully others.

refinement: The story suggests that Darren is a considerate and sensitive person. Despite being of a different crowd and listening to different music, Darren is able to show compassion for others, even in times of hardship. Darren also sees the absurdity in the funeral home Christmas tree, and the two spend time having fun in the cemetery.

answer: Darren smokes a lot of weed. He pretends to like the narrator's music because they're friends and he's nice. He's a sensitive guy under his wannabe-thug persona. He turns off his rap music when the narrator says he doesn't like it, and isn't mad about it because he's considerate. He's always talking about the rapture, even though he never goes to church. The narrator believes that if Heaven exists, Darren would go.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize everything relating to the narrator's family.

answer: The narrator attends the viewing for his great aunt Margret. His grandma said that he or his broughter ought to be pall bearers. Since his brother was afraid of dropping the casket, the narrator offered to do it, but Margret's niece declined. The narrator believes Margret is in Heaven because she was a real sweet lady.

answer: The narrator is related to Margret. He seems to live with their grandmother and brother. Their father lives separately, not being mentioned in this text.

text: The second sentence is a bit clunky. There is also no mention of a father in the text.

refinement: The narrator is related to Margret. We do not know who he lives with but we know he has a brother and a grandma. He seems connected to his extended family.

answer: The narrator's great aunt Margret died, and at her viewing the narrator volunteered to be a pallbearer. There was also a Christmas tree set up in the lobby of the funeral home with names of dead people written on the bulbs. The narrator and Darren went down to the cemetery to smoke a joint, and the oldsmobile parked there scared the narrator while he was urinating. The narrator's family seems to consist mostly of relatives who have passed away.

answer: The narrator's grandma says she says either him or his brother ought to be pallbearers at her great aunt Margret's viewing. They went to the cemetery together to smoke pot and talk about the rapture where the narrator starts kicking a tin can. His friend Darren kept talking about the rapture and they kept talking until they got back and they got in the Olds near the white shed.

text: The response has little to do with the question.

refinement: The narrator is related to Margret. We do not know who he lives with but we know he has a brother and a grandma. He seems connected to his extended family.

answer:
The narrator's great aunt Margret died, and the viewer attendees discussed the body and other mundane topics. The narrator then noticed the funeral home's Christmas tree and found the decorations morbid and strange.

The narrator's family consists of the narrator and their brother, as well as their great aunt Margret. The family is predominantly composed of older people and the narrator's brother is nervous around dead people. Though the narrator considers himself nice, Darren is even nicer. The narrator and Darren got stoned and observed a tin can in the street, and the narrator eventually urinated against a white shed, which caused someone to honk their car horn and scare the narrator. The narrator does not mind the resulting urine on their leg, which is indicative of their generally good-hearted nature.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the narrator's movements after he meets up with Darren.

answer: After meeting up with his friend Darren, the narrator goes to the cemetery and smokes a joint, then goes for a walk afterward. While walking, the narrator finds a tin can in the street, and as he is peeing behind an empty car, the car's horn is accidentally blown, causing him to piss on himself.

answer: After the narrator and Darren meet, they meet up with his friend at the cemetery to smoke a joint. They walk a bit and when they leave the cemetery, go to kick a tin can back to Darren's place until the narrator needs to go to the bathroom.

text: The narrator and Darren did not go to the cemetery to meet a friend.

refinement: After the narrator and Darren meet, they left for the cemetery to smoke a joint. The friends left the cemetery afterward, kicking a can down the street. Suddenly the narrator felt the need to go to the bathroom, so he zipped down to take a piss nearby. The narrator pissed into an empty can until a nearby car honked, which made him piss on himself in surprise.

answer: The narrator meets with Darren at Darren's house. They go to the cemetery. Once they exit the cemetery, they kick a can down an alley. The narrator goes behind an old white shed to pee. When the narrator realizes there is someone in the car parked on the other side of the alley, he and Darren run away as fast as they can.

answer: The narrator went to Darren's house and smoked a joint together. While walking back from the cemetery, the narrator sees a funeral home Christmas tree and is disturbed by it. After kicking a tin can around an alley, the narrator ends up pissing down his leg when a car honks at him. Despite the pee, the narrator doesn't mind too much.

answer: The two go to a cemetery directly after visiting the funeral home and smoking a joint. Darren convinces the narrator that his drug-use and bad behavior "isn't that bad" while encouraging him to follow in those footsteps. After visiting the cemetery, the two hang out kicking a tin can until the narrator pisses and causes it to fall, causing the narrator to pee himself.

text: The response does not seem to cover what happened after the narrator met with his friend. Some for the sentences also do not make sense.

refinement: After the narrator and Darren meet, they left for the cemetery to smoke a joint. The friends left the cemetery afterward, kicking a can down the street. Suddenly the narrator felt the need to go to the bathroom, so he zipped down to take a piss nearby. The narrator pissed into an empty can until a nearby car honked, which made him piss on himself in surprise.


text:
“Do you want some coke man?”

I smiled and shook my head no.

“Some ecstasy?”

I realized I had stopped walking.  I took a long look at the three boys. I really wasn’t in the mood for this.  “That’s not me”, escaped my lips as I took a few more steps.

“Come on man… sit down … smoke a joint?” beckoned the leader of the pack with an accent that puzzled me.

I was already pleasantly high. The prospect of more was unnecessary and unappealing. I had scoped out this narrow lane earlier in the day and was anxious to reach my destination. As rough as the trio looked the leader’s eyes seemed trustworthy. The giant thug sharing the bench to his left was nearly passed out and the younger, thinner boy to his right appeared harmless. The essence of primrose trapped in the moist, motionless air permeated the vicinity. My olfactory nerves convinced me things would be ok.

“What the hell”, I muttered and walked toward them.  A canal and its reflected light softly dancing behind them added to the exoticism. The leader nudged the brute toward consciousness and made a space for me between the two. I only had a hundred and fifty Euro on me and as a betting man I wagered with myself that I would walk home with zero soon. My habit of being ‘real’ with all walks of life had so far done me little harm. I called upon myself to reinforce my pact with serendipity and eased on to the wooden bench.

The brazen young man’s name was Kofi. All three were from Suriname. The dark olive color and virility of his skin was strangely comforting. We chatted as he broke apart his buds and prepared a large joint. The thug seemed to abhor me. He infinitely repeated how gangster he was in broken English and flashed his knife ad infinitum as well. It was a bit comical the power Kofi held over him. The pack leader rebuked him with increasing force for his lack of hospitality.  I simply showed the angry youth respect and interest. I somehow made it clear to him that I all I could do was trust him. We both understood if he wanted to rob or kill me I would put up no defense. The younger member of the group was strongly under the influence of a hallucinogen and spoke to me rapidly in his native tongue. My sincere return of his gaze sated him.

“You’re with us tonight American”, Kofi said with a smile, “This is our city… We do is what we want”.  He lit the joint and passed it to me first. Rather than indulge I passed it on to the muscle who appreciated my deference. We sat and smoked. I puffed lightly as I was unsure of the exact contents of the roll. All the while the thug praised his gangbanging skills when alert enough to do so. After a reasonable time had passed I informed Kofi I was off to the Red Light District. This was my first night in Amsterdam and I intended to experience it on my terms.

“We show you the way” said Kofi. He then barked orders out to his underlings and we were off. Ten steps later the giant was emptying his stomach on to the small road. The other two enjoyed very much the sights and sounds of the tough guy reduced to near infant status. I sensed the opportunity to escape and said my goodbyes.

I knew the way. Earlier in the day I had plotted and explored the route to sexual release. I crossed the canal and headed north alongside it. It must have been three in the morning. This part of the city seemed asleep. Once again the scent of flowers was strong. Jasmine it seemed this time. Surprising it could flourish it in such a northern climate. The buildings all seemed the same from the walkway. Three or four stories high and true sturdy shelters which entirely muted any activity within. I walked along for a kilometer or so and all remained quiet until my desired neighborhood was in sight.

I arrived one canal east of my intended entry point. Large groups of people sat at tables outdoors carousing and partying with the energy I once possessed. I walked directly past a couple of bars and not one person gave me a glance. Finally, I saw my beacon. To my left was an erect cement cylinder two feet high with glowing red pin lights lining its upper circumference.  When I saw the third pillar of expectation I took a left. I was surprised at the emptiness of the narrow walkway. The well trodden old bricks of the path were each surrounded by a generous moss which reflected muted neon purple. Not a single woman displayed herself as I slowly walked toward the canal intended to guide me. A left turn at my canal of dreams brought my loins to life. People were milling about and the prospect of open windows looked much better.

Not twenty paces later two round brown eyes were locked on mine by way of a mirror. It was the first time in my recalled memory someone took note of me before I had the chance to size them up. I nodded my head as I passed her below ground lookout post and admired how her skin shone bronze contrasting her white breast supporter. Black lighting increases most human’s allure without doubt. I took a left at the next street and was instantly pierced by dozens of eyeballs. Most were behind glass but a few uttered nearly inaudible invitations in sultry voices. A subtle sensory overload granted force by testosterone enveloped me. Finally I got past the eyes and began to notice bodies. All this transpired within fifteen meters.

A graze against my right arm shocked me into immobility as a jack-in-the-box witnessed for the first time would. I nearly screamed but quickly noted the black silk glove teasing its way under the sleeve of my t-shirt. I looked into the eyes of a raven haired knockout nearly my own height.

“Come inside?”, oozed out of lips unlike any others.

I paused, looked intently into her eyes, and begged for release. Literally thirty seconds had passed since the first sales pitch had been presented. “You are truly beautiful”, escaped my lips as I bowed my head and continued down the lane.

The moss’s glow was overpowered by the light swimming on the bricks. This street felt right. The declined lips had initiated a carnal desire which could be sated at my whim.  I felt the benefits of a true smile for the first time in years. I made a quick choice to continue my walk in the center of the lane.

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title: Vagabond

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about the relationship between the narrator and the boys from Suriname?

answer: At first, the narrator did not want to follow the boys from Suriname but he did. The leader of the group asked him to sit. The narrator then offered to buy some drugs, which they declined. The narrator then shared with them the route he was heading. He then spent the night chatting with them until the ogre placed them in a position to rob him. This did occur, but the narrator realized he had made a pact with serendipity and would walk away with zero.

text: Incoherent response

text: Provide a response

refinement: The men offer the narrator drugs, and he reluctantly stops, because he feels the leader looks trustworthy. The largest of the men apparently doesn't like the narrator, and it is clear that if he wanted to rob or kill the narrator, the narrator would not be able to stop them. The men are distracted when the large one starts vomiting, and the narrator takes the opportunity to "escape."

answer: The narrator, new in Amsterdam, was walking along a road when he encountered three Suriname boys. Their accent confused him because he realised it wasn't Dutch, which made him realise they had to be from another part of town or country. The gang leader, Kofi, invited him to smoke a joint with them, which he begrudgingly agreed to because he was still high on another drug. One of the boys was particularly belligerent towards the narrator. Still, it didn't bother him because Kofi was amiable, and he rebuked the other boy's actions and behaviour. While they smoked and discussed, the narrator revealed that he was going to Red Light District. Kofi offered to show him the way, but the narrator already knew his way there and found an excuse to leave their presence.

answer: The relationship between the narrator and the boys from Suriname is initially mistrustful, but eventually develops into a mutual respect. The boys initially offer drugs and other illicit things, but the narrator declines these offers. Eventually, the boys agree to escort the narrator to the Red Light District, and the interaction becomes more warm. While walking the streets, the narrator is approached by a beautiful woman and instead decides to continue down the path to explore the Red Light District. The interaction between the boys from Suriname and the narrator is ultimately characterized by mutual respect and trust.

text: The narrator gets away from the boys before going to the Red Light District

refinement: The relationship between the narrator and the boys from Suriname is initially mistrustful, but eventually develops into a mutual respect. The boys initially offer drugs and other illicit things, but the narrator declines these offers. Eventually, the boys agree to escort the narrator to the Red Light District, but the narrator gets away from them. While walking the streets, the narrator is approached by a beautiful woman and instead decides to continue down the path to explore the Red Light District. The interaction between the boys from Suriname and the narrator is ultimately characterized by mutual respect and trust.

text: I would not say the last sentence is accurate

refinement: The relationship between the narrator and the boys from Suriname is initially mistrustful, but eventually develops into a mutual respect. The boys initially offer drugs and other illicit things, but the narrator declines these offers. Eventually, the boys agree to escort the narrator to the Red Light District, but the narrator gets away from them. While walking the streets, the narrator is approached by a beautiful woman and instead decides to continue down the path to explore the Red Light District.

text: The narrator accepts when they offer pot

refinement: The relationship between the narrator and the boys from Suriname is initially mistrustful, but eventually develops into a mutual respect. The boys initially offer drugs and other illicit things, and the narrator accepts. Eventually, the boys agree to escort the narrator to the Red Light District, but the narrator gets away from them. While walking the streets, the narrator is approached by a beautiful woman and instead decides to continue down the path to explore the Red Light District.

answer: They met for the first time shortly before he expected to begin his sexual activities in Amsterdam. The boys offered their company to the narrator, and he accepted their company, wondering if their company would give him an edge in the Red Light District. Kofi offered the joint to him. Ultimately, the narrator parted company with the boys at his own pace.

text: The narrator never wondered "if their company would give him an edge in the Red Light District"

refinement: They met for the first time shortly before he expected to begin his sexual activities in Amsterdam. The boys offered their company to the narrator, and he accepted their company. Kofi offered the joint to him. Ultimately, the narrator parted company with the boys at his own pace.

answer: The relationship between the narrator and the boys from Suriname is respectful, trusting and tolerant. The narrator is not interested in the substances the boys offer but does agree to take a seat with them. It seems that the boys trust the narrator and are eager for his company. It seems by their invitation to show the narrator the Red Light District that the boys consider the narrator as one of their own.


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JOVAN OVČAREVIĆ (; 1557) was a Habsburg Serb nobleman. He was a member of the Ovčarević family, a notable Serb family in Habsburg service in the 16th century, and was a kinsman or descendant of the earlier Petar Ovčarević (fl. 1521–41), a Šajkaši commander and spy, and relative of contemporaries Mihailo Ovčarević (fl. 1550–79), a Šajkaši commander, and Dimitrije Ovčarević (fl. 1552–66), the captain of Gyula.[1] Jovan Ovčarević was mentioned as accompanying a mission to the sultan in 1557, being in the entourage of Vrančić and Franja Zaj while they were legates in Constantinople. Nothing more is known of him.[2]

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title: Jovan Ovčarević

question: Who was Jovan Ovčarević?

answer: He was a Habsburg Serb nobleman.

answer: Jovan Ovčarević was a Habsburg Serb nobleman.

answer: He was a Habsburg Serb nobleman.

answer: Jovan Ovčarević was a Habsburg Serb nobleman who was a member of the Ovčarević family.

question: Explain what is known of Jovan Ovčarević.

answer: He was a member of the Ovčarević family, a notable Serb family in Habsburg service in the 16th century. He was a kinsman or descendant of the earlier Petar Ovčarević, a Šajkaši commander and spy.

answer: Jovan Ovčarević was a member of the Ovčarević family, a notable Serb family in Habsburg service in the 16th century. He was mentioned as accompanying a mission to the sultan in 1557, accompanying Vrančić and Franja Zaj while they were legates in Constantinople. Nothing else is known about him.

answer: Jovan Ovčarević was a Habsburg Serb nobleman. He was a member of the Ovčarević family, a notable Serb family in Habsburg service in the 16th century, and was a kinsman or descendant of the earlier Petar Ovčarević (fl. 1521–41), a Šajkaši commander and spy, and relative of contemporaries Mihailo Ovčarević (fl. 1550–79), a Šajkaši commander, and Dimitrije Ovčarević (fl. 1552–66), the captain of Gyula. Jovan Ovčarević was mentioned as accompanying a mission to the sultan in 1557, being in the entourage of Vrančić and Franja Zaj while they were legates in Constantinople. Nothing more is known of him.

answer: He was in the entourage of Vrancic and Franja Zaj while they were legates in Constantinople.

text: The answer has insufficient details about Jovan as there is more information about him in the article.

refinement: Jovan Ovčarević was a member of the Ovčarević family, a notable Serb family in Habsburg service in the 16th century. He was mentioned as accompanying a mission to the sultan in 1557, with Vrančić and Franja Zaj while they were legates in Constantinople. Nothing else is known about him.

question: When was Jovan Ovčarević a member of the Ovčarević family?

answer: In the 16th century.

answer: Jovan Ovčarević was a member of the Ovčarević family in 1557.

answer: Jovan Ovčarević was a member of the Ovčarević family in the 16th century.

answer: He was a member of the Ovčarević family in the 16th century.

question: Who was Jovan Ovčarević a descendant of?

answer: Jovan Ovčarević was a descendant of Petar Ovčarević, a notable Serb in Habsburg service in the 16th century.

answer: Of Petar Ovčarević, a Šajkaši commander and spy.

text: 'Of' should be eliminated from the beginning of the sentence.

refinement: Petar Ovčarević, a Šajkaši commander and spy.

answer: Jovan Ovčarević was a descendant of Petar Ovčarević.

answer: Jovan Ovčarević was a descendant of Petar Ovčarević.

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: Jovan Ovčarević was a Serb nobleman who was part of a delegation to the Ottoman Sultan in 1557. Nothing else is known about him.

text: The summary does not mention whom he descended from and whom he was an accompanying delegate to the sultan in 1557.

refinement: Jovan Ovčarević was a Serb nobleman who was a kinsman or descendant of Petar Ovčarević, a commander and spy. In 1557, he was part of a delegation to the Ottoman Sultan with Vrancic and Franja Zaj.

answer: Jovan Ovčarević was a Habsburg Serb Nobleman in the 16th century and descendant of Petar Ovčarević, a Šajkaši commander and spy. Little else is known of him.

answer: Jovan Ovčarević was a Habsburg Serb nobleman who was a member of the Ovčarević family. He was a kinsman or descendant of the earlier Petar Ovčarević, a Šajkaši commander and spy, and relative of contemporaries Mihailo Ovčarević, a Šajkaši commander, and Dimitrije Ovčarević, the captain of Gyula.

answer: Jovan Ovčarević was a Habsburg Serb nobleman. He was a member of the Ovčarević family, a notable Serb family in Habsburg service in the 16th century.


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[The _Dionysus_ of the Palazzo Altemps, Rome]

The over-lifesize marble _DIONYSUS WITH PANTHER AND SATYR_ in the Palazzo Altemps,[1] Rome, is a Roman work of the 2nd century AD, found in the 16th century[2] on the Quirinal Hill at the time foundations were being dug for Palazzo Mattei at Quattro Fontane.[3] The statue was purchased for the Ludovisi collection, where it was first displayed in front of the _Palazzo Grande_, the main structure of the Villa Ludovisi, and by 1641 in the gallery of sculptures in the _Casino Capponi_ [4] erected for Cardinal Ludovico Ludovisi in the villa's extensive grounds. By 1885, it had been removed to the new Palazzo del Principe di Piombino, nearby in via Veneto. With the rest of the Boncompagni-Ludovisi collection, which was open to the public on Sundays and covered in the guidebooks,[5] and where it had become famous,[6] it was purchased in 1901 for the City of Rome, as the Ludovisi collection was dispersed and the Villa's ground built over at the end of the 19th century.

The formula, with somewhat exaggerated _contrapposto_, the god's right hand resting on his head, is based on the Apollo Lyceus, which is variously attributed and dated. This ivy-crowned Dionysus is accompanied by the panther that signalises his numinous presence, and a satyr of reduced size, a member of his retinue. Long locks of his hair fall girlishly over his shoulders and in his left hand he holds a bunch of grapes, emblematic of his status as god of wine.

The original elements are the heads, torsos and thighs of Dionysus and the satyr. The arms of the satyr and the lower legs and base are modern— that is, 16th-century— restorations.

Notes

[1] Inventory number 8606.

[2] It appeared in Giovan Battista Cavalieri, _Antiquarum Statuarum Urbis Romae tertius et quartus liber_, (Rome, 1594), plate 74.

[3] According to the tradition recorded by the sculptor-dealer and diarist Flaminio Vacca, _Memorie di varie antichità trovate in diversi luoghi della citta di Roma_, Rome, 1704, (memoria 37).

[4] Gruppo colossale di Dionisio e satiro: description, history, conservation, bibliography

[5] (Octavian Blewitt) _Handbook for travellers in central Italy_ (Murray), Part II, 1853, _s.v._ “Rome §79 Villas” etc.

[6] “The youthful, or so-called Theban Bacchus, was carried to ideal beauty by Praxiteles... The finest statue of this kind is in the villa Ludovisi” (William Smith, _A New Classical Dictionary of Greek and Roman Biography, Mythology and Geography_, 1871, _s.v._ “Dionysus”); “...the eyes most intense and soft; the hair in curls, close to the head, brown with streaks of gold, strangely resembling the hair of some Greek statue — perhaps the Ludovisi Bacchus...” (William Francis Barry, _Arden Massiter_, 1900, p. 16.)

title: Ludovisi Dionysus

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why is the work named as the Ludovisi Dionysus?

answer: The sculpture was purchased for the Ludovisi collection and it was displayed there until the collection was moved to another location.

text: It's not clear if the word "Ludovisi" came in the name of the statue due to it being purchased for the Ludovisi collection.

refinement: The sculpture was purchased for the Ludovisi collection and it was displayed there until the collection was moved to another location. That may be the reason why it's called Ludovisi Dionysus.

text: The statue was erected for Cardinal Ludovico Ludovisi.

refinement: The sculpture was purchased for the Ludovisi collection and it was displayed there until the collection was moved to another location. The statue was erected for Cardinal Ludovico Ludovisi. That may be the reason why it's called Ludovisi Dionysus.

answer: The 2nd century AD roman work would be found in the 16th century and then purchased and added to the Ludovisi collection. Without an identifiable creator, the work is likely to have been named as such due to its association to the Ludovisi.

text: The name should be capitalized.

refinement: The 2nd century AD Roman work would be found in the 16th century and then purchased and added to the Ludovisi collection. Without an identifiable creator, the work is likely to have been named as such due to its association to the Ludovisi.

text: The statue was already found in the 16th century.

refinement: The 2nd century AD Roman work was found in the 16th century and then purchased and added to the Ludovisi collection. Without an identifiable creator, the work is likely to have been named as such due to its association to the Ludovisi.

text: Ludovisi was the name of the Cardinal. Hence, "to the" is unnecessary.

refinement: The 2nd century AD Roman work was found in the 16th century and then purchased and added to the Ludovisi collection. Without an identifiable creator, the work is likely to have been named as such due to its association with Ludovisi.

text: The response doesn't mention who Ludovisi is.

refinement: The 2nd century AD Roman work was found in the 16th century and then purchased and added to the Ludovisi collection. Without an identifiable creator, the work is likely to have been named as such due to its association with Cardinal Ludovico Ludovisi.

answer: The work is called the Ludovisi Dionysus because it was originally found in the Palazzo Altemps, Rome and was later purchased as part of the Ludovisi collection. It is based off the Greek god Dionysus, also with a satyr and a panther. The original elements of the statue including the heads, torsos, and thighs are from the 2nd century AD. However, the arms of the satyr and the lower legs and base are from a later restoration, likely from the 16th century. Therefore, the work is named the Ludovisi Dionysus because it was once part of the Ludovisi collection.

text: The statement is incorrect. The work was found in the 16th century on Quirinal Hill.

refinement: The work called the Ludovisi Dionysus was found in the 16th century on Quirinal Hill and was later purchased as part of the Ludovisi collection. It is based off the Greek god Dionysus, also with a satyr and a panther. The original elements of the statue including the heads, torsos, and thighs are from the 2nd century AD. However, the arms of the satyr and the lower legs and base are from a later restoration, likely from the 16th century. Therefore, the work is named the Ludovisi Dionysus because it was once part of the Ludovisi collection.

answer: The work is named the Ludovisi Dionysus because it is a Roman work of the 2nd century AD found in the 16th century at the time of Palazzo Mattei's construction on the Quirinal Hill and because it is part of the Ludovisi collection. Specifically, it is known as the Ludovisi Dionysus because it is associated with the Villa Ludovisi and Cardinal Ludovico Ludovisi.

text: It's no more a part of the Ludovisi collection.

refinement: The work is named the Ludovisi Dionysus because it is a Roman work of the 2nd century AD found in the 16th century at the time of Palazzo Mattei's construction on the Quirinal Hill and because it was part of the Ludovisi collection. Specifically, it is known as the Ludovisi Dionysus because it is associated with the Villa Ludovisi and Cardinal Ludovico Ludovisi.

text: Doesn't mention that it features Dionysus.

refinement: The work is named the Ludovisi Dionysus because it is a Roman work of the 2nd century AD, featuring Dionysus, found in the 16th century at the time of Palazzo Mattei's construction on the Quirinal Hill and because it was part of the Ludovisi collection. Specifically, it is known as the Ludovisi Dionysus because it is associated with the Villa Ludovisi and Cardinal Ludovico Ludovisi.

answer: This information is not found in the article.

text: While the information isn't directly found in the article, it is implied as the statue is of Dionysus and was purchased for the Ludovisi collection belonging to Cardinal Ludovico Ludovisi.

refinement: It's likely named so because it features a statue of Dionysus, the Greek God of Wine, and was purchased in the 16th century for the Ludovisi collection belonging to Cardinal Ludovico Ludovisi.


text:
We walked through a vale holding each other's hand. I felt perfectly comfortable remaining silent and marching along as long as I
knew she was with me. We had reached past the point of us needing speech to get our emotions across. We continued strolling for a while
and then finally sat on a bench which was perched under an arched outgrowth of a stony structure. She put Her head on my lap and closed
Her eyes. My love grew for Her every second I watched Her beautiful face in deep sleep. I wondered whether she felt the same way,
or whether she felt at all. Suddenly, I sensed the earth moving. The whole world around me was shaking. I realised I didn't have
much time left. I was about to depart. Slowly, the waterfall, flowers, the lake, butterflies, and the mountains faded away
into darkness and then a bright light met my eye. The brightness diminished and I was back in my room. My servant was standing in front
of me. "Sir, why are you so hard to wake up these days? If you carry on going late to work, you will eventually be fired. You don't want
that do you?" he said. If only he knew.
 I was both happy and sad. I felt sad leaving Her, but I was happy that it had now worked three times in a row. How lucky was I, that having slept a sad
sleep the day before yesterday, I would meet Her the second time. This ignited in me the thought of the possibility that I could meet Her whenever I wanted to.
So I tried to meet Her the third time today. I was doubtful and skeptical. I am a middle aged man who has never experienced love. Forget the act of loving,
I couldn't even think of the prospect of finding love in my lifetime. I turned off all the lights, locked the door, threw myself on the bed and closed my eyes.
I was failing. I was sweating uncontrollably with nervousness. This was my last chance to find what I never had. Then, I thought of Her, with Her soft and
beautiful face, Her enigmatic eyes, Her endless locks of hair, Her slender yet graceful body, the vulnerability in Her glances, Her voice that confirmed the
presence of angelic minstrels. God himself had sent down this perfect entity for me to spend time with, albeit in a second reality. I had to calm down and sleep.
I was no longer panting, and was able to slowly drift away into slumber.
 I was in a vast empty ball room. It was beautiful, but right now, I had no concern for the beauty of inanimate objects. I had to find Her as quickly as I could, so I
could maximise the amount of time I was to spend with Her. I looked for her everywhere. Where was she? Was it really possible that I failed, even in bringing a being that lived inside my thoughts,
to appear in front of me? I was suddenly struck by the memory of yesterday. I had stood in front of the mirror for an hour. I gazed at my disfigured body, my
hunched back, my crooked teeth, my uneven face and my uninteresting eyes. I had decided to break every mirror in my house that day, for they were only a source of pain
to me. Now, as I looked around for her in the ballroom, I slowly became demoralised. I could not even find Her in a second reality. I wept and I wept, and for sure, I
did know I was physically weeping too, for I felt the dampness seep through my body. 'Come here,' said an enchanting voice. 'Did you really think I was going to leave
you alone?'
 A white figure seemed to be approaching me. Her shape became more apparent as she moved towards me. She was dressed in the most elegant of elegant dresses.
She came up to me, and without uttering a word, kissed me. All my doubts, inferiorities and insecurities vanished in a matter of seconds. 'You have me right now and you
will have me forever,' she said. 'My appearance may change but I will always be Her.' We sat together on the velveted floor. I told her everything I knew and everything
I wanted to do. She listened patiently without any patronising judgement. She seemed as if she had been lost in my discourse. She comforted me when I told her my doubts
and answered me when I had queries. Seconds, minutes, hours and then days seemed to have passed by. We were still sat on the same spot talking and being lost in wonder
of one another. 'I have to go fly,' she said with a hint of sycophancy, 'Try not to think about me.' She faded away gradually, and slowly, the whole room turned dim
and finally, my whole vision was obscured. I woke up.
 I opened my eyes and looked around. I wasn't in my room. There were people around me, maybe four or five. 'Sir, you have been in a coma for six years. My whole team
and I would like to congratulate you on being born again. Also try to sleep less,' a doctor said, letting out a faint chuckle. I wasn't able to speak as I
lay there helpless. I didn't care about anyone else other than Her. I wanted to go back and never come back. A memory came to my mind about when I met my childhood friend
after several years.
'What brought you into acting then, James?' I asked.
'My wife... the third one, she pushed me towards getting a job as an actor. She had faith in my ability. And so right she was, I had never even dreamed of
achieving such fame.' James answered.
'Good for you, my friend, if only I were a part of your gene pool.'
'My gene pool? You think I've only gotten this far because of my looks?'
'You never were intelligent were you? Only if you were, you could have acknowledged the luck that had been bestowed upon you. Nobody falls in love with character
at first sight. Set on this earth is a bliss for the rich and beautiful.'
'You always were a jealous man weren't you? Stop envying other people's abilities and go back to your cave and hang out with your rodents, you incompatible oddity!'
He stormed out of the restaurant leaving me alone with my food and strangers' stares. He was right. I was an oddity.
 I had regained consciousness and was out of my coma. I had been awake thinking about this incident while tears ran down my face. It was soon dark outside
and I started feeling drowsy. I was about to sleep and it was the most joyous part of the day. I soon fell asleep but there were no dreams this day and I woke up without any
recollection of Her. 'This wouldn't happen again,' I thought to myself. I slept the next day and again; no luck. The next day, I entered a dream but she was nowhere
to be seen. Did she lie when she said she would be with me forever? I was discharged from the hospital and returned to my room. Surely, this was where it all started so
I will get to meet her when I sleep in my own dwelling. I slept. She had abandoned me. The only companion I had, had abandoned me. She was a part of me so I guess I had
abandoned myself.
 'There is more than one way a person can sleep.' I thought to myself. I started panting. I walked in circles for an hour in my room as my heartbeat became faster
and faster. I had no family or acquaintances I could talk to. I started climbing the stairs sluggishly, that led to the highest storey of the high-rise. My pulse increasing
with every step I took. I finally arrived at the top of the skyscraper. I stood at its edge, with my heart pounding the loudest and fastest it had ever pounded. I thought
of Her one last time. 'I will surely meet you, and I would never know even if I don't. My real love has always been the sleep that rescued me by allowing me to dream.'
With these thoughts, I took the step to death. The only feeling I felt after that was the feeling of Nothing.

title: SLEEP Please review :)

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about the protagonist and James?

answer: They seem to be in a cafe and chat with each other at length. The protagonist (known as the narrator) wonders if James used to have to use his looks for his early immersion in the film industry. The alter ego of the narrator calls him an incompatible oddity who does nothing but envy other people's success. James leaves, calling the narrator a jealous man.

text: The answer is wrong entirely.

text: The answer is empty.

refinement: James is the protagonist's childhood friend whom he sees late in life. James found success as an actor after his wife believed in him enough to push him. The protagonist accuses James of achieving his success with his looks since James isn't intelligent ("You never were intelligent were you?"). James calls him an incompatible oddity and curses at him before leaving.

answer: James is the narrator's childhood friend and an actor. He tends to get career advice from him, and so James is important to the protagonist. One night, the protagonist went to James's restaurant to catch up with James, and it was there that the protagonist was jealous of James's wealth, which he implied to be a blessing due to physical appearance and luck. James gets irritated and storms out. The next time the protagonist sees him is at the hospital, where the protagonist has been in a coma for 6 years. During his conversation with James, the protagonist fantasizes about a girl from his coma dreams.  The protagonist despises himself for being a not-so-fortunate man in regards to his looks, and so despite all the money he has, he claims not to have a good life because he does not have a good family and friends.

text: Most of the answer is irrelevant. Where relevant, it's wrong.

text: The answer is empty.

refinement: James is the protagonist's childhood friend whom he sees late in life. James found success as an actor after his wife believed in him enough to push him. The protagonist accuses James of achieving his success with his looks since James isn't intelligent ("You never were intelligent were you?"). James calls him an incompatible oddity and curses at him before leaving.

answer: The narrator's childhood friend is a man named James. James is a famous actor who went into acting after his third wife pushed him to pursue a career in it. She had faith in his abilities, and she was right. The narrator envies James. He insults his friend by saying he achieved his fame not because he was intelligent or talented, but due to his good looks. James tells the narrator he's an incompatible oddity and storms out on him.

answer: The protagonist views James as luck-filled and privileged due to his success as an actor. The protagonist envies James and wishes he could be more consistent in meeting his love. The protagonist takes drastic measures to meet his love after she abandoned him, and ultimately takes his own life. It seems that the protagonist views James as more fortunate in regards to meeting the love of his life.

answer: The protagonist despairs over the loss of a loved one and believes that there is no chance of ever meeting her again. James is described as lucky and intelligent and the protagonist is jealous of his abilities. The protagonist ultimately decides to take a step to death in order to be reunited with his loved one. From this, it can be inferred that the protagonist views James as more genuinely loved.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How does the story describe the protagonist?

answer: The protagonist is lonely and has never experienced love. He mourns the loss of his love in his waking hours and then seeks to reconnect with her while in deep sleep. Eventually, his love appears in his dreams and he is elated, but then she disappears only to return and then leave him again. The protagonist is driven to despair and eventually takes his own life in order to reunite with his love in death.

text: The answer should mention that the protagonist met his love in dreams instead of lying about the death of someone who was never real according to the story.

refinement: The protagonist is lonely and has never experienced love. He dreams of someone and falls in love with her; he seeks to reconnect with her while in deep sleep. Eventually, his love appears in his dreams and he is elated, but then she disappears only to return and then leave him again. The protagonist is driven to despair and eventually takes his own life in order to reunite with his love in death.

text: The answer omits that the protagonist spends six years in a coma, dreaming about his love.

refinement: The protagonist is lonely and has never experienced love. He dreams of someone and falls in love with her; he seeks to reconnect with her while in deep sleep. Eventually, his love appears in his dreams and he is elated. After a long dream, she leaves him, telling him not to think of her. That takes six years, during which the protagonist is in a coma. The protagonist is driven to despair and eventually takes his own life in order to reunite with his love in death.

answer: The protagonist is a middle-aged man who has never had full grasp of what love is. Nevertheless, he seems to delight in the fantasy of love he creates in his mind. He also only sleeps, having being diagnosed as a sleepwalker that falls in a comatose-like state each night.

text: The sleepwalking part is made up.

refinement: The protagonist is a middle-aged man who has never had full grasp of what love is. Nevertheless, he seems to delight in the fantasy of love he creates in his mind.

text: The answer is too vague. It should express the protagonist's compulsion, the reason behind it, and how it all ends.

refinement: The protagonist is lonely and has never experienced love. He dreams of someone and falls in love with her; he seeks to reconnect with her while in deep sleep. Eventually, his love appears in his dreams and he is elated. After a long dream, she leaves him, telling him not to think of her. That takes six years, during which the protagonist is in a coma. The protagonist is driven to despair and eventually takes his own life in order to reunite with his love in death.

answer: The protagonist is middle-aged man and doesn't know love. He finds a comfort in a dream and when the dream starts to fade he tries to chase it, and doesn't know that he's in a coma. When he comes out of the coma and doesn't have this dream anymore, he internalizes the failure and he kills himself.

text: What the protagonist finds in the dream is love, which is why he sinks into the dream so completely. He doesn't fall into a coma because the dream is fading.

refinement: The protagonist is middle-aged man and doesn't know love. He finds love in a dream and tries to chase it, and doesn't know that he's in a coma. When he comes out of the coma and doesn't have this dream anymore, he internalizes the failure and he kills himself.

text: The protagonist dies to unite with his lover.

refinement: The protagonist is middle-aged man and doesn't know love. He finds love in a dream and tries to chase it, and doesn't know that he's in a coma. When he comes out of the coma and doesn't have this dream anymore, he kills himself to reunite with his love.

answer: The protagonist is initially hesitant and skeptical about meeting with his love in a second reality and is beset by self-doubt. Upon meeting his love, however, he falls in love with her and is happy and sad to leave her. Over time, he grows disillusioned with the experience of meeting with her and she ultimately leaves him. The protagonist ultimately chooses to commit suicide and realizes in the moment before his death that his true love has always been sleep, rather than the love lost.

answer: The protagonist is a middle-aged man who has never experienced love. He has a disfigured body - hunched back, crooked teeth, an uneven face, and uninteresting eyes. Because of his disfigurement, he can't think of the prospect of finding love in his lifetime. He became obsessed with a woman in his dreams. The protagonist is a jealous man who even envied his childhood friend's fame and good looks.

text: The answer omits the protagonist's final fate.

refinement: The protagonist is a middle-aged man who has never experienced love. He has a disfigured body - hunched back, crooked teeth, an uneven face, and uninteresting eyes. Because of his disfigurement, he can't think of the prospect of finding love in his lifetime. He became obsessed with a woman in his dreams. The protagonist is a jealous man who even envied his childhood friend's fame and good looks. After he loses the girl in his dreams, he commits suicide to reunite with her.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What caused the protagonist to slip into a six-year coma?

answer: Since the protagonist was convinced that he will never find love, he became obsessed with a woman he saw in one of his dreams. He slept again the next day hoping to find her and he did. This ignited the thought that he could meet her in his dreams anytime he wanted to, so he slept again. This time, he had a hard time finding her, wept, and gave up. A woman wearing an elegant dress approached him and told him she was the woman (her appearance changed) and all seemed right again. However, the woman had to leave him in the dream despite telling him she will be with him forever. Presumably, because of this complicated dream, the protagonist slipped into a six-year coma and only woke up when the woman said goodbye and faded away.

answer: The protagonist slipped into a coma after purposefully jumping off a high-rise balcony.

text: The answer has nothing to do with the text.

text: The answer is empty.

refinement: Since the protagonist was convinced that he will never find love, he became obsessed with a woman he saw in one of his dreams. He slept again the next day hoping to find her and he did. This ignited the thought that he could meet her in his dreams anytime he wanted to, so he slept again. This time, he had a hard time finding her, wept, and gave up. A woman wearing an elegant dress approached him and told him she was the woman (her appearance changed) and all seemed right again. However, the woman had to leave him in the dream despite telling him she will be with him forever. Presumably, because of this complicated dream, the protagonist slipped into a six-year coma and only woke up when the woman said goodbye and faded away.

answer: Not enough sleep.

answer: A suicide attempt

answer: The protagonist slipped into a coma because he tried to meet his dream lover in his second reality during sleep. However, when he finally awoke from his coma and tried to meet her again in his dreams, she disappeared without a trace. This caused him to feel depressed and to attempt suicide.

text: The aftermath of the coma is irrelevant.

refinement: The protagonist slipped into a coma because he tried to meet his dream lover in his second reality during sleep.


text:
My mom only had one eye. I hated her… She was such an embarrassment. She cooked for students and teachers to support the family.
There was this one day during elementary school where my mom came to say hello to me. I was so embarrassed.
How could she do this to me? I ignored her, threw her a hateful look and ran out. The next day at school one of my classmates said, “EEEE, your mom only has one eye!”
I wanted to bury myself. I also wanted my mom to just disappear. I confronted her that day and said, “If you’re only gonna make me a laughing stock, why don’t you just die?”
My mom did not respond… I didn’t even stop to think for a second about what I had said, because I was full of anger. I was oblivious to her feelings.
I wanted out of that house, and have nothing to do with her. So I studied real hard, got a chance to go abroad to study.
Then, I got married. I bought a house of my own. I had kids of my own. I was happy with my life, my kids and the comforts. Then one day, my Mother came to visit me. She hadn’t seen me in years and she didn’t even meet her grandchildren.
When she stood by the door, my children laughed at her, and I yelled at her for coming over uninvited. I screamed at her, “How dare you come to my house and scare my children! GET OUT OF HERE! NOW!!!”
And to this, my mother quietly answered, “Oh, I’m so sorry. I may have gotten the wrong address.” – and she disappeared out of sight.
One day, a letter regarding a school reunion came to my house. So I lied to my wife that I was going on a business trip. After the reunion, I went to the old shack just out of curiosity.
My neighbors said that she died. I did not shed a single tear. They handed me a letter that she had wanted me to have.
“My dearest son,
I think of you all the time. I’m sorry that I came to your house and scared your children.
I was so glad when I heard you were coming for the reunion. But I may not be able to even get out of bed to see you. I’m sorry that I was a constant embarrassment to you when you were growing up.
You see……..when you were very little, you got into an accident, and lost your eye. As a mother, I couldn’t stand watching you having to grow up with one eye. So I gave you mine.
I was so proud of my son who was seeing a whole new world for me, in my place, with that eye.
With all my love to you,
Your mother.”

title: My "ONE EYED MOM"

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What is ironic about the protagonist hating his mother for only having one eye?

answer: The ironic part is that the protagonist, who hates his mother for only having one eye, is himself living with one eye in his head. While the protagonist noticed and was embarrassed by his mother's imperfection, he had not considered how embarrassing it must be for her to raise a child with one eye.

text: She gave up her eye donating it to her son who had lost his eye in an accident.

refinement: What's ironic is that he hates his mother for only having one eye, but she only has one eye because she donated one to him after he lost an eye in an accident.

answer: It was he that lost his one eye in an accident, and his mother felt that it was worse for him to have lost his one eye than to have another person's one eye. She donated her eye in an effort to spare him pain.

answer: He had lost an eye in an accident and his mother donated her eye to him.

answer: It's an effect of the accident he did not know he had as a child, which is the reason that his mother only had one eye.

text: Doesn't explicitly say that she donated her eye to him after he lost it.

refinement: It's an effect of the accident he did not know he had as a child in which he lost an eye, the reason that his mother only had one eye was because she donated one to him.

answer: The irony is that the protagonist hates his mother for only having one eye, when he himself became blind in one eye in an accident as a child. His mother gave him her eye to help him see the world through her perspective. His hatred for his mother caused him to shun her, when in reality, she was trying to show him love and support.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why was the protagonist embarrassed about his mother's one eye?

answer: The protagonist was embarrassed about his mother's one eye due to the ridicule and embarrassing looks he received from his peers when his mother came to visit him during elementary school. He didn't realize until much later how selfless and brave his mother was for sacrificing everything in order to help him see a "whole new world." He was ashamed of the way he behaved toward her and realized the true extent of her selfless love.

answer: The other children made fun of her.

answer: The protagonist was embarrassed about his mother's one eye because he felt like she was an embarrassment. He wanted to be free of her and his surroundings, and she was a constant reminder of this. He was embarrassed because his classmates made fun of him for his mother's eye and he felt ashamed.

answer: The other children at school mention his mother's one eye.

answer: He was ashamed of her working to support him.

text: The other kids at school ridiculed him because of her one eye.

refinement: The other kids at school ridiculed him because of her one eye.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How did the protagonist get the letter from his mom?

answer: The protagonist received the letter from his mother after a reunion he attended. She wrote it while she was dying in her bed, apologizing for her constant embarrassment of her son when he was growing up because she had given him her eye following an accident when he was little.

text: Doesn't describe how the letter came to be in his possession - through their old neighbor with whom she left the letter.

refinement: The protagonist received the letter from his mother after a reunion he attended. He went to visit his mother at their old address only to find she had died. He spoke with the neighbors who gave him the letter after she left it with them to deliver to him. She wrote it while she was dying in her bed, apologizing for her constant embarrassment of her son when he was growing up because she had given him her eye following an accident when he was little.

answer: The protagonist got the letter from his mother's neighbors. She had specifically asked them to give it to him at the reunion after her death. In the letter, she apologized for always being an embarrassment to him, and expressed how proud she was that the protagonist had grown up with one eye, a part of her.

answer: The neighbors of his mother- the family next door- handed him the letter from his mom.

answer: She sent it after she died.

text: She gave it to the neighbors to deliver to him when he came by.

refinement: She left the letter with her neighbors in case he ever came by after her death.

answer: It was left with an old neighbor to be given to him.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Did the protagonist feel bad about how he had treated his mother after the revelation that she had sacrificed for him?

answer: Doesn't say

answer: Yes. he did.

text: Doesn't say, but it's implied that anyone in that situation would feel bad.

refinement: Doesn't say, but it's implied that anyone in that situation would feel bad.

answer: It may be implied that he felt remorse

answer: Yes, the protagonist does feel bad about how he had treated his mother after the revelation that she had sacrificed for him.

text: Doesn't say, but it's implied that anyone in that situation would feel bad.

refinement: Doesn't say, but it's implied that anyone in that situation would feel bad.

answer: Yes, the protagonist eventually realized that he had been harsh and disrespectful to his mother. He felt bad about how he had treated her and understood how much she had sacrificed for him.

text: Doesn't say, but it's implied that anyone in that situation would feel bad.

refinement: Doesn't say, but it's implied that anyone in that situation would feel bad.

question: Write a ~6 sentence summary.

answer: The protagonist's mom only had one eye and was a constant embarrassment to him when he was growing up. One day, the mother came to visit and the children laughed at her while the protagonist screamed at her to leave. The mother left a letter after she died explaining that she had given her eye to the protagonist when he was younger. The protagonist's feelings of anger and embarrassment were replaced with guilt and regret upon reading the letter.

text: Isn't clear that the protagonist had lost an eye and the mother donated her to him.

refinement: The protagonist's mom only had one eye and was a constant embarrassment to him when he was growing up. One day, the mother came to visit and the children laughed at her while the protagonist screamed at her to leave. The mother left a letter after she died explaining that she had given her eye to the protagonist when he was younger and had lost an eye in an accident. The protagonist's feelings of anger and embarrassment were replaced with guilt and regret upon reading the letter.

text: Speculation. Doesn't actually say how the protagonist felt about his mother's letter.

refinement: The protagonist's mom only had one eye and was a constant embarrassment to him when he was growing up. One day, the mother came to visit and the children laughed at her while the protagonist screamed at her to leave. The mother left a letter after she died explaining that she had given her eye to the protagonist when he was younger and had lost an eye in an accident.

text: Doesn't mention that the protagonist completely cut his mother out of his life.

refinement: The protagonist's mom only had one eye and was a constant embarrassment to him when he was growing up. One day, the mother came to visit and the children laughed at her while the protagonist screamed at her to leave. As he grew up, the protagonist completely cut his mother out of his life due to embarrassment and anger of her. The mother left a letter after she died explaining that she had given her eye to the protagonist when he was younger and had lost an eye in an accident.

answer: The protagonist is embarrassed by and angry at his mother for only having one eye. The other children at school make fun of him for it and he's driven to get away from her by any means possible. After completely cutting her out of his life, she resurfaces appearing at his home. He chases her away when his children are shocked to see she has only one eye. After he visits his old school for a reunion, he goes to the old shack where he used to live, but the neighbors tell him she has died. They present him with a letter in which she apologizes for always embarrassing him and explains that he had lost an eye in an accident and she donated her eye to him so he wouldn't have to live life with only one eye.

answer:
The narrator has hated his mother for cooking for students and teachers to support the family. He graduated and wanted out of his house in any possible way. He wanted to avoid her shame.
After years, his mother visits him. His two-eyed kids laugh at her. He yells at her and kicks her out. After one reunion, they inform him that she died. They hand him a letter.

text: He's most embarrassed that she has one eye and the other students make fun of them.

refinement:
The narrator has hated his mother for cooking for students and teachers to support the family. What's worse, the other kids make fun of them because she only has one eye. He graduated and wanted out of his house in any possible way. He wanted to avoid her shame.
After years, his mother visits him. His two-eyed kids laugh at her. He yells at her and kicks her out. After one reunion, they inform him that she died. They hand him a letter.

text: Doesn't mention that the protagonist completely cut her out of his life.

refinement:
The narrator has hated his mother for cooking for students and teachers to support the family. What's worse, the other kids make fun of them because she only has one eye. He graduated and wanted out of his house in any possible way. He wanted to avoid her shame, completely cutting her out of his life.
After years, his mother visits him. His two-eyed kids laugh at her. He yells at her and kicks her out. After one reunion, they inform him that she died. They hand him a letter.

text: Doesn't mention that the neighbors delivered her letter after her death when he visited after the reunion.

refinement:
The narrator has hated his mother for cooking for students and teachers to support the family. What's worse, the other kids make fun of them because she only has one eye. He graduated and wanted out of his house in any possible way. He wanted to avoid her shame, completely cutting her out of his life.
After years, his mother visits him. His two-eyed kids laugh at her. He yells at her and kicks her out. After a high school reunion in town, he visits the shack where they lived and is informed by the neighbors that she died. They hand him a letter.

text: The letter divulges how she lost her eye- she donated it to him after he lost an eye in an accident.

refinement:
The narrator has hated his mother for cooking for students and teachers to support the family. What's worse, the other kids make fun of them because she only has one eye. He graduated and wanted out of his house in any possible way. He wanted to avoid her shame, completely cutting her out of his life.
After years, his mother visits him. His two-eyed kids laugh at her. He yells at her and kicks her out. After a high school reunion in town, he visits the shack where they lived and is informed by the neighbors that she died. They hand him a letter. The letter divulges how she lost her eye- she donated it to him after he lost an eye in an accident as a boy.

answer:
In elementary school, the narrator was embarrassed by his mother only having one eye. She worked for students and teachers as a cook to support their family.

When he grew up, he moved abroad to study, got married, then became content with his own children. He shunned his mother at his front door.

One day, his mother came to visit on a school reunion, only he lied to his wife he was going on a business trip. He went to the old shack to visit her but found she had died.

When he saw the neighbors the next day, he was handed a letter from his mother. It said how sorry she was she had scared her grandchildren, that she had pre-empted her son getting hurt by wearing his eye instead.

text: Doesn't mention the school children would make fun of her and him because of the one eye.

refinement:
In elementary school, the narrator was embarrassed by his mother only having one eye. She worked for students and teachers as a cook to support their family. The other school children would make fun of them because she only had one eye.

When he grew up, he moved abroad to study, got married, then became content with his own children. He shunned his mother at his front door.

One day, his mother came to visit on a school reunion, only he lied to his wife he was going on a business trip. He went to the old shack to visit her but found she had died.

When he saw the neighbors the next day, he was handed a letter from his mother. It said how sorry she was she had scared her grandchildren, that she had pre-empted her son getting hurt by wearing his eye instead.

text: Doesn't mention that he completely cut her out of his life due to anger and embarrassment.

refinement:
In elementary school, the narrator was embarrassed by his mother only having one eye. She worked for students and teachers as a cook to support their family. The other school children would make fun of them because she only had one eye.

When he grew up, he moved abroad to study, got married, then became content with his own children. He completely cut her out of his life due to embarrassment and anger. He shunned his mother at his front door.

One day, his mother came to visit on a school reunion, only he lied to his wife he was going on a business trip. He went to the old shack to visit her but found she had died.

When he saw the neighbors the next day, he was handed a letter from his mother. It said how sorry she was she had scared her grandchildren, that she had pre-empted her son getting hurt by wearing his eye instead.

text: Doesn't clarify that he shunned her when she came to visit out of the blue or that his children made fun of her.

refinement:
In elementary school, the narrator was embarrassed by his mother only having one eye. She worked for students and teachers as a cook to support their family. The other school children would make fun of them because she only had one eye.

When he grew up, he moved abroad to study, got married, then became content with his own children. He completely cut her out of his life due to embarrassment and anger. He shunned his mother at his front door when she came to visit out of the blue, his children made fun of her.

One day, his mother came to visit on a school reunion, only he lied to his wife he was going on a business trip. He went to the old shack to visit her but found she had died.

When he saw the neighbors the next day, he was handed a letter from his mother. It said how sorry she was she had scared her grandchildren, that she had pre-empted her son getting hurt by wearing his eye instead.

text: The mother didn't come to visit again, he went to visit because of a school reunion.

refinement:
In elementary school, the narrator was embarrassed by his mother only having one eye. She worked for students and teachers as a cook to support their family. The other school children would make fun of them because she only had one eye.

When he grew up, he moved abroad to study, got married, then became content with his own children. He completely cut her out of his life due to embarrassment and anger. He shunned his mother at his front door when she came to visit out of the blue, his children made fun of her.

One day, he went to a school reunion, only he lied to his wife he was going on a business trip, and he went to the old shack to visit her but found she had died.

When he saw the neighbors the next day, he was handed a letter from his mother. It said how sorry she was she had scared her grandchildren, that she had pre-empted her son getting hurt by wearing his eye instead.

text: Not clear that she had donated her eye to him after he lost his in an accident.

refinement:
In elementary school, the narrator was embarrassed by his mother only having one eye. She worked for students and teachers as a cook to support their family. The other school children would make fun of them because she only had one eye.

When he grew up, he moved abroad to study, got married, then became content with his own children. He completely cut her out of his life due to embarrassment and anger. He shunned his mother at his front door when she came to visit out of the blue, his children made fun of her.

One day, he went to a school reunion, only he lied to his wife he was going on a business trip, and he went to the old shack to visit her but found she had died.

When he saw the neighbors the next day, he was handed a letter from his mother. It said how sorry she was she had scared her grandchildren, that she had donated her eye to him after he lost his eye in an accident as a boy.

answer: The narrator has a one-eyed mother that they hated out of shame and embarrassment. One day, the mother came to visit the narrator and their children laughed, making the narrator angry. The mother apologized and left. At a school reunion, the mother died and the narrator received a letter in which the mother revealed that she had given her eye to her son as an act of love. She was proud of her son and wanted to make up for the embarrassment she caused by giving him her eye.

text: Doesn't mention that the other school kids would make fun of them because she only had one eye.

refinement: The narrator has a one-eyed mother that they hated out of shame and embarrassment because the other school kids made fun of them due to her one eye. One day, the mother came to visit the narrator and their children laughed, making the narrator angry. The mother apologized and left. At a school reunion, the mother died and the narrator received a letter in which the mother revealed that she had given her eye to her son as an act of love. She was proud of her son and wanted to make up for the embarrassment she caused by giving him her eye.

text: Doesn't mention that he completely cut her out of his life.

refinement: The narrator has a one-eyed mother that they hated out of shame and embarrassment because the other school kids made fun of them due to her one eye. One day, after completely cutting her out of his life, the mother came to visit the narrator and his children laughed, making the narrator angry; the mother apologized and left. At a school reunion, the mother died and the narrator received a letter in which the mother revealed that she had given her eye to her son as an act of love. She was proud of her son and wanted to make up for the embarrassment she caused by giving him her eye.

text: Doesn't clarify that that the protagonist goes to a school reunion and visits the shack where his mom lived, the neighbors informed him she died and gave him a letter from her.

refinement: The narrator has a one-eyed mother that they hated out of shame and embarrassment because the other school kids made fun of them due to her one eye. One day, after completely cutting her out of his life, the mother came to visit the narrator and his children laughed, making the narrator angry; the mother apologized and left. When the protagonist attends a school reunion in town, he visits the shack where his mom lives and is informed by the neighbors that the mother died, they give him a letter from her in which the mother revealed that she had given her eye to her son as an act of love. She was proud of her son and wanted to make up for the embarrassment she caused by giving him her eye.

text: Doesn't clarify that she donated her eye to him after he lost his as a kid. Incorrectly precedes the shame before the eye is donated.

refinement: The narrator has a one-eyed mother that they hated out of shame and embarrassment because the other school kids made fun of them due to her one eye. One day, after completely cutting her out of his life, the mother came to visit the narrator and his children laughed, making the narrator angry; the mother apologized and left. When the protagonist attends a school reunion in town, he visits the shack where his mom lives and is informed by the neighbors that the mother died, they give him a letter from her in which the mother revealed that she had given her eye to her son as an act of love after he lost his eye in an accident as a boy.