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Small waves lapped against the next contestant as she bobbed in the water. The game was called “Don’t shit a brick.” The goal was to see who could doggy paddle the longest while holding a brick. Juvenile, sure. Was it fun? You’re damn right it was.

Jennifer had cried out with glee when she first entered the water, then her face squished in like a sponge when she was handed the brick. She momentarily grimaced as the red, clay brick scraped against her inner thigh. But she managed to hold onto it surrounded by the vibrantly colored speedboats of her classmates.

Her red and blue bikini top was fastened tight around her neck, but the grasping texture of the brick threatened to expose her sun shaded breasts to the boys leaning off the sides of their boats, cheering wildly like she was crossing the finish line with each minor stroke.

The coldness of Lake Holshire had sucked my breath away earlier in the afternoon, when the first round of tubing had begun.  The coldness could be seen on Jennifer’s face, in the way she gasped for air and kept her eyes focused on one spot in the sky.

Maybe if we had brought more than one brick, the contestant would have felt better about dropping it to the mossy bottom below. As it were, Jennifer struggled with the weight and the beers she had drank earlier.

She managed to keep herself afloat as someone yelled, “She looks like she’s shitting a brick!”

The three speedboats all had their engines killed and their anchor points tethered, leaving a triangular opening in the water. As Jennifer struggled with her clay weight, the boats sloshed and shimmied so that Jennifer was no longer in the center of the triangle, but closer to Davis’ boat, a shining red and black beast that could hit sixty miles an hour without blinking.

I yelled to Davis, “Get her out, man. She’s finished.”

He didn’t even look at me, but kept staring down at the top of her breasts that glistened just above the surface of the water.

In the afternoon sun, the water was a navy blue, like the oppressive folds of storm clouds about to spit rain.

Davis was now laying on the edge of his Mastiff, as he called the red and black racer, urging Jennifer to just give up and take her top off. She didn’t need to be weighed down by it. Her faux laugh filled her mouth with Lake water, which she spit out with squinting eyes.

“Shut up, Dave,” was all she managed to mouth before slipping under water.

Davis turned to Trev, “Did you hear what she said?” He didn’t see her submerge into the triangle of darkness, like a pole searching for the bottom of Lake Holshire.

The water rippled outwards where the crown of her head had gone under, breaking symmetry on the side of the Mastiff. One, two, three seconds pass. No sign of her. She’s not coming up. I search the black water to see if I can find her, but cannot.

I glance at the others. There’s more than a dozen people and not one of them seems concerned that Jennifer has just taken the plunge to death. She’s a caught bobber and no one wants to reel her in.

Alcohol does dumb shit to people.

I dive in, momentarily wondering if I should have jumped in feet first rather than swan dive into the water. But I don’t hit her. I open my eyes and am amazed at how bright it is underwater. The boats cast long shadows down a corridor of the lake, but there’s wide expanses receiving bright sunlight now. I can see Jennifer with her eyes closed about ten feet below.

She is drifting there like a person caught between a dream and waking. She’s let go of the brick but her hands still hold it near her chest. Something in the water brushes against my eyelids causing them to close momentarily. I fear she’ll be dead when I get her in my arms. Will she drift away when I’m back?

I reach her, grab her underneath her arms and start kicking for the surface. I can see the long angular shadows from the boats spread wider and wider, until I’m panting above the dark expanse of the black triangle.

title: Black Triangle

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why is Jennifer struggling?

answer: She's holding the brick with her arms. She's underwater under long and heavy brick.

text: "Long and heavy brick" Brick is not a mass noun. Brick is a count noun. The semantics of this sentence make no sense.

refinement: She's holding the brick with her arms. She's underwater balancing a brick.

text: She also had some beers

refinement: She's holding a brick with her arms. She's underwater holding it as part of a game. She also had some beers earlier.

answer: Jennifer is struggling because she has been given a brick underwater and has to doggy paddle while holding it. She is struggling because the weight is causing her to struggle for breath, and because people around her are cheering and urging her to give up. Additionally, she may have drowned because she submerged without anyone noticing and did not reappear.

text: *not to give up

refinement: Jennifer is struggling because she has been given a brick underwater and has to doggy paddle while holding it. She is struggling because the weight is causing her to struggle for breath, and because people around her are cheering and urging her not to give up. Additionally, she may have drowned because she submerged without anyone noticing and did not reappear.

answer: Jennifer has doggy paddled out longer than the others, but it seems the red clay brick scrapes her inner thigh and exhausts her. She looks stressed.

text: She has also had some beers

refinement: Jennifer has doggy paddled out longer than the others, but it seems the red clay brick scrapes her inner thigh and exhausts her. She has also had some beers.

answer: Jennifer is struggling because she has to hold a brick while doggy paddling in the water, and the weight of the brick is exhausting her. Additionally, she is surrounded by fast boats and being teased to give up and take her top off. She submerges under water and does not resurface, and so someone dives in to rescue her.

answer: Jennifer is struggling because she is attempting to swim with a brick. The brick is rough and she risks losing her bikini top. She has been drinking and may feel that she can't drop the brick because the group has only brought one brick with them. If she drops it, someone will have to retrieve it or they will have no one else can play. The water is also bitterly cold.

text: "they will have" is not the correct verb

refinement: Jennifer is struggling because she is attempting to swim with a brick. The brick is rough and she risks losing her bikini top. She has been drinking and may feel that she can't drop the brick because the group has only brought one brick with them. If she drops it, someone will have to retrieve it or no one else can play. The water is also bitterly cold.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why does nobody besides the narrator do anything to help Jennifer?

answer: Most people in the situation are intoxicated and no one seems to care that she might be dead or fighting for her life. They instead want to see her struggle and embarrass herself. This drives them to watch her until she submerges under the water and does not come back up. Without anyone to help get her out of the water, the narrator decides to save her and brings her to the surface.

answer: Nobody helps Jennifer because they are all intoxicated and are more interested in watching what she will do than actually doing anything to help her. Nobody wants to take responsibility for her safety, or even worry about whether she lives or dies, because it doesn't impact them enough.

answer: Some haven't noticed that she has slipped under the water. They have all been drinking and "alcohol does dumb shit to people". Perhaps those who have seen Jennifer go under, hope that someone else will save her.

answer: They were drinking

answer: They are partly because of the narrator's comment and partly because Jennifer started going under despite not being finished.

text: Multiple issues here of coherence and accuracy but it is so incoherent it's hard to know what it is trying to say

refinement: They have been drinking. They do not want to take responsibility


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The ELECTORAL INTEGRITY PROJECT is an academic project based at Harvard University and the University of Sydney which seeks to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide. The project freely publishes its Perceptions of Electoral Integrity dataset for scholarly use. The most recent data release (PEI 6.0) covers 285 elections in 164 countries from mid 2012 to the end of 2017. The founding Director is Pippa Norris.[1]

The project received media attention in 2016 when it ranked the United States last among western nations.[2] One of the project's International Advisory Board, Andrew Reynolds, a political science professor at the University of North Carolina at Chapel Hill, noted in the Raleigh-based _News and Observer_ that his home state's election integrity score was similar to Cuba, Indonesia and Sierra Leone.[3] The study ranked integrity of the state's congressional districts lowest in the nation just below similar outlier Wisconsin.[4][5] An editorial in the _Wall Street Journal_ ridiculed the study, noting that “Democracy in New York (which scored a 61) and Virginia (60) is supposedly more imperiled than in Rwanda (64), though Rwanda is controlled by an autocrat. The worst-performing state, Arizona (53), is outranked by Kuwait (55), Ivory Coast (59) and Kyrgyzstan (54).”[6] Dylan Matthews writing in _Vox_ agreed that “it seems foolish to infer from that that the US is less of a democracy than Rwanda” but felt that the EIP had highlighted important issues such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws.[7]

Statistician Andrew Gelman had a negative view of the PEI Index, commenting that “[it] all seems like an unstable combination of political ideology, academic self-promotion, credulous journalism, and plain old incompetence”, noting among other things that the EIP's 2014 data release has previously given the North Korean parliamentary election an 'electoral integrity' score of 65.3 and Cuba 65.6, higher than elections in EU members Romania and Bulgaria.[8][9][10] Norris addressed the controversy in two long replies to Gelman, noting that her team had subsequently dropped the North Korean election from the dataset. Gelman, however, questioned her justification for this removal and continued to question the EIP's methodology more generally.[11][12]

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title: Electoral Integrity Project

question: Who came up with the Electoral Integrity Project?

answer: It was based at Harvard University and the University of Sydney.

text: The founding Director is Pippa Norris.

refinement: It was founded by its first Director, Pippa Norris.

answer: The Director, Pippa Norris, at Harvard University and the University of Sydney.

text: The article doesn't elaborate on which university Norris is affiliated with.

refinement: Director Pippa Norris. The project is based at Harvard University and the University of Sydney.

text: The names of the affiliated universities aren't related to the question.

text: "The founding Director is Pippa Norris."

answer: It is based at Harvard University and the University of Sydney.

text: It was founded by Pippa Norris.

question: Define the Electoral Integrity Project.

answer: The Electoral Integrity Project is an academic project that seeks to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide by providing a Perceptions of Electoral Integrity (or "PEI") dataset. The project ranks electoral integrity scores for various elections around the world.

text: Proof for the project's mission: "The ELECTORAL INTEGRITY PROJECT is an academic project ... which seeks to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide."

text: Proof for worldwide coverage: "The most recent data release (PEI 6.0) covers 285 elections in 164 countries from mid 2012 to the end of 2017."

answer: The Electoral Integrity Project is an academic study that uses quantitative data to assess the degree of electoral integrity in various countries. Specifically, researchers assign a "Perceptions of Electoral Integrity" score to each country by gauging the integrity of its electoral process.

text: The project aims to quantify electoral integrity since it's not something easily quantifiable.

refinement: The Electoral Integrity Project is an academic study that aims to quantify electoral integrity in various countries. Specifically, researchers assign a "Perceptions of Electoral Integrity" score to each country by gauging the integrity of its electoral process.

text: Proof for the project's mission: "The ELECTORAL INTEGRITY PROJECT is an academic project ... which seeks to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide."

answer: It is an academic project that seeks to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide.

text: Proof for the project's mission: "The ELECTORAL INTEGRITY PROJECT is an academic project ... which seeks to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide."

question: Why did Gelman have a negative view of the PEI Index?

answer: Gelman stated that the "all seems like an unstable combination of political ideology, academic self-promotion, credulous journalism, and plain old incompetence."

text: Gelman's examples are very useful in elucidating his views.

refinement: Gelman stated that the "all seems like an unstable combination of political ideology, academic self-promotion, credulous journalism, and plain old incompetence." He noted that the project gave North Korea a higher score than EU members Romania and Bulgaria in 2014.

text: Grammar mistakes.

refinement: Gelman stated that "[it] all seems like an unstable combination of political ideology, academic self-promotion, credulous journalism, and plain old incompetence." He noted that the project gave North Korea a higher score than EU members Romania and Bulgaria in 2014.

answer: He felt that it "all seems like an unstable combination of political ideology, academic self-promotion, credulous journalism, and plain old incompetence."

text: Gelman's examples are very useful in elucidating his views.

refinement: He felt that it "all seems like an unstable combination of political ideology, academic self-promotion, credulous journalism, and plain old incompetence." He noted that the project gave North Korea a higher score than EU members Romania and Bulgaria in 2014.

answer: He said that it seems like an unstable combination of political ideology, academic self-promotion, credulous journalism, and incompetence.

text: Gelman's examples are very useful in elucidating his views.

refinement: He said that it seems like an unstable combination of political ideology, academic self-promotion, credulous journalism, and incompetence. He noted that the project gave North Korea a higher score than EU members Romania and Bulgaria in 2014.

text: Gelman's quote should be denoted as such.

refinement: He said that it "seems like an unstable combination of political ideology, academic self-promotion, credulous journalism, and incompetence." He noted that the project gave North Korea a higher score than EU members Romania and Bulgaria in 2014.

question: What does PEI stand for?

answer: The ELECTORAL INTEGRITY PROJECT measures and quantifies electoral integrity worldwide, and its most recent data release categorizes elections according to perceived integrity level.

text: The answer as it stands is completely irrelevant to the question. PEI stands for "Perceptions of Electoral Integrity".

refinement: PEI stands for "Perceptions of Electoral Integrity".

answer: The Electoral Integrity Project (or "PEI") conducts research on the perceived integrity of elections worldwide.

text: The answer doesn't elucidate what PEI stands for, which is "Perceptions of Electoral Integrity" while giving irrelevant information.

refinement: PEI stands for "Perceptions of Electoral Integrity".

answer: It stands for Perceptions of Electoral Integrity.

text: Acronym's first use in the article: "... Perceptions of Electoral Integrity dataset for scholarly use. The most recent data release (PEI 6.0)..."

question: What countries are mentioned in this article?

answer: 164 countries are mentioned.

text: The question isn't asking for the number of countries the project has looked at. It asks for the ones mentioned in the article. They are the United States, Cuba, Indonesia, Sierra Leone, Rwanda, Kuwait, Ivory Coast, Kyrgyzstan, North Korea, Romania, and Bulgaria.

refinement: They are the United States, Cuba, Indonesia, Sierra Leone, Rwanda, Kuwait, Ivory Coast, Kyrgyzstan, North Korea, Romania, and Bulgaria.

answer: United States, Cuba, Indonesia, Sierra Leone, Kuwait, Rwanda, Ivory Coast, Kyrgyzstan, North Korea, Romania, and Bulgaria

answer: The article includes 164 countries.

text: The question isn't asking for the number of countries the project has looked at. It asks for the ones mentioned in the article. They are the United States, Cuba, Indonesia, Sierra Leone, Rwanda, Kuwait, Ivory Coast, Kyrgyzstan, North Korea, Romania, and Bulgaria.

refinement: They are the United States, Cuba, Indonesia, Sierra Leone, Rwanda, Kuwait, Ivory Coast, Kyrgyzstan, North Korea, Romania, and Bulgaria.

question: Write a ~3 sentence summary.

answer: The Electoral Integrity Project is an academic project that analyzes the integrity of elections worldwide based on statistics collected. The EIP has recently ranked the United States last of western nations in terms of electoral integrity, causing some controversy, but also raising important issues such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws.

text: The project aims to quantify the perceptions about electoral integrity.

refinement: The Electoral Integrity Project is an academic project that aims to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide. The EIP has recently ranked the United States last of western nations in terms of electoral integrity, causing some controversy, but also raising important issues such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws.

text: The gist of the critiques against the project by Gelman is relevant.

refinement: The Electoral Integrity Project is an academic project that aims to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide. The EIP has recently ranked the United States last of western nations in terms of electoral integrity, causing some controversy, but also raising important issues such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws. Statistician Andrew Gelman harshly criticized the methodology of the project, calling it "an unstable combination of political ideology, academic self-promotion, credulous journalism, and plain old incompetence".

text: Proof for worldwide: "The ELECTORAL INTEGRITY PROJECT ... seeks to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide."

text: The USA as the last of the Western nations: "The project received media attention in 2016 when it ranked the United States last among western nations."

text: Raised issues: "EIP had highlighted important issues such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws."

answer: The Electoral Integrity Project is a project that seeks to measure and quantify the integrity of elections worldwide. It aims to do this by ranking individual elections by perceived integrity, and publishing the results free of charge for academic usage. While the project has been met with some criticism, it has also brought attention to more problematic areas of voting, such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws that need to be addressed.

text: The criticisms are somewhat downplayed in the summary.

refinement: The Electoral Integrity Project is a project that seeks to measure and quantify the integrity of elections worldwide. It aims to do this by ranking individual elections by perceived integrity, and publishing the results free of charge for academic usage. While the project has been met with some harsh criticism and ridicule, it has also brought attention to more problematic areas of voting, such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws that need to be addressed.

text: Minor grammar issues.

refinement: The Electoral Integrity Project is a project that seeks to measure and quantify the integrity of elections worldwide. It aims to do this by ranking individual elections by perceived integrity and publishing the results free of charge for academic usage. While the project has been met with some harsh criticism and ridicule, it has also brought attention to more problematic areas of voting, such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws that need to be addressed.

text: Proof for worldwide: "The ELECTORAL INTEGRITY PROJECT ... seeks to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide."

text: Raised issues: "EIP had highlighted important issues such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws."

text: Critiques: "An editorial in the _Wall Street Journal_ ridiculed the study"

answer: The Electoral Integrity Project (EIP) is an academic project which measures the integrity of elections and publishes its findings. Some findings have found that the United States' electoral integrity score falls below that of other western nations, notably last out of western countries in 2016. However, the project has received some criticism for its methodology and findings, with some suggesting that it may mostly be using ideological rather than objective factors to score elections.

text: The project aims to quantify the perceptions about electoral integrity worldwide.

refinement: The Electoral Integrity Project (EIP) is an academic project which aims to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide and publishes its findings. Some findings have found that the United States' electoral integrity score falls below that of other western nations, notably last out of western countries in 2016. However, the project has received some criticism for its methodology and findings, with some suggesting that it may mostly be using ideological rather than objective factors to score elections.

text: "Some findings have found that the United States' electoral integrity score falls below that of other western nations" is a misleading phrase. There was only one mention of such a thing, which happened in the EIP's 2016 release.

refinement: The Electoral Integrity Project (EIP) is an academic project which aims to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide and publishes its findings. The project found the US to be the last in terms of electoral integrity among the Western nations in 2016. However, the project has received some criticism for its methodology and findings, with some suggesting that it may mostly be using ideological rather than objective factors to score elections.

text: The critiques about methodology are from Andrew Gelman.

refinement: The Electoral Integrity Project (EIP) is an academic project which aims to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide and publishes its findings. The project found the US to be the last in terms of electoral integrity among the Western nations in 2016. However, the project has received some criticism for its methodology and findings, with the statistician Andrew Gelman suggesting that it may mostly be using ideological rather than objective factors to score elections.

text: Proof for worldwide: "The ELECTORAL INTEGRITY PROJECT ... seeks to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide."

text: Critiques: "An editorial in the _Wall Street Journal_ ridiculed the study"

answer: The Electoral Integrity Project is an academic project which aims to measure the integrity of elections worldwide. The project generates a dataset on electoral integrity, which has ranked the United States below other western nations, in particular states with low integrity scores in their congressional districts. This has raised some controversy, especially in response to the North Korean election scoring higher than western democracies. However, the project asserts that the tool is valuable for highlighting important issues such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws.

text: The project ranked the USA below all other Western nations in 2016, not in general.

refinement: The Electoral Integrity Project is an academic project which aims to measure the integrity of elections worldwide. The project generates a dataset on electoral integrity, which has ranked the United States below other western nations in 2016, in particular states with low integrity scores in their congressional districts. This has raised some controversy, especially in response to the North Korean election scoring higher than western democracies. However, the project asserts that the tool is valuable for highlighting important issues such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws.

text: "in particular states with low integrity scores in their congressional districts" is nonsensical phrasing in the sentence and should be omitted.

refinement: The Electoral Integrity Project is an academic project which aims to measure the integrity of elections worldwide. The project generates a dataset on electoral integrity, which has ranked the United States below other western nations in 2016. This has raised some controversy, especially in response to the North Korean election scoring higher than western democracies. However, the project asserts that the tool is valuable for highlighting important issues such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws.

text: The raised controversy part should note that the issues against the project are more general while using the example of North Korea scoring higher than Romania and Bulgaria.

refinement: The Electoral Integrity Project is an academic project which aims to measure the integrity of elections worldwide. The project generates a dataset on electoral integrity, which has ranked the United States below other western nations in 2016. This and North Korea ranking above EU members Romania and Bulgaria have caused controversy among more general concerns about methodology. However, the project asserts that the tool is valuable for highlighting important issues such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws.

text: It's not the EIP's official assertion that says the tool is valuable. It comes from Dylan Matthews.

refinement: The Electoral Integrity Project is an academic project which aims to measure the integrity of elections worldwide. The project generates a dataset on electoral integrity, which has ranked the United States below other western nations in 2016. This and North Korea ranking above EU members Romania and Bulgaria have caused controversy among more general concerns about methodology. However, Dylan Matthew asserts that the tool is valuable for highlighting important issues such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws.

text: Raised issues: "EIP had highlighted important issues such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws."

text: The USA as the last of the Western nations: "The project received media attention in 2016 when it ranked the United States last among western nations."

answer: The Electoral Integrity Project is an academic project focused on gathering data on elections to rank their integrity internationally. This project has ranked the United States as having lower electoral integrity than some other Western countries, causing controversy with some who have questioned their methodology.

text: The project ranked the US as the lowest among Western countries.

refinement: The Electoral Integrity Project is an academic project focused on gathering data on elections to rank their integrity internationally. This project has ranked the United States as having the least electoral integrity than other Western countries, causing controversy with some who have questioned their methodology.

text: The controversy isn't just about the US being ranked last among Western nations. It's more general and has several examples in the article.

refinement: The Electoral Integrity Project is an academic project focused on gathering data on elections to rank their integrity internationally. This project has ranked the United States as having the least electoral integrity than other Western countries. This and North Korea ranking above EU members Romania and Bulgaria have caused controversy among more general concerns about methodology.

text: Raised issues: "EIP had highlighted important issues such as gerrymandering and voter registration laws."

text: Proof for international: "The ELECTORAL INTEGRITY PROJECT ... seeks to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide."

answer: This article discusses the Electoral Integrity Project, an academic project that seeks to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide. It's based at Harvard University and the University of Sydney. Its most recent data release  covers from mid-2012 to the end of 2017.

text: The information about the affiliated universities is a lot less relevant than the reception to the project.

refinement: This article discusses the Electoral Integrity Project, an academic project that seeks to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide. The project garnered criticisms for many reasons, including the ranking of North Korea above EU members Romania and Bulgaria, but Dylan Matthews still finds it useful for highlighting important issues like gerrymandering and voter registration laws. Its most recent data release  covers from mid-2012 to the end of 2017.

text: Gelman's critique is a lot more relevant than the latest release information.

refinement: This article discusses the Electoral Integrity Project, an academic project that seeks to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide. The project garnered criticisms for many reasons, including the ranking of North Korea above EU members Romania and Bulgaria, but Dylan Matthews still finds it useful for highlighting important issues like gerrymandering and voter registration laws. Statistician Andrew Gelman harshly criticized the methodology of the project, calling it "an unstable combination of political ideology, academic self-promotion, credulous journalism, and plain old incompetence".

text: Proof for worldwide: "The ELECTORAL INTEGRITY PROJECT ... seeks to quantify the integrity of elections worldwide."


text:
PAUL READY is a British actor. In 2016, he played Kevin in _Motherland_[1]. In 2018, he played the role of Rob MacDonald in the BBC television series _Bodyguard_, and Henry Goodsir in AMC's _The Terror_[2]. In 2019, Paul played journalist Nick Caplan in the BBC television series _MotherFatherSon_[3]. His film credits include _The Death of Stalin_. He received a commendation at the 2003 Ian Charleson Awards.

Early life

Ready was born in Birmingham and growing up in the town of Harborne he attended King Edward VI Five Ways school within the city. He went on to train at London Academy of Music and Dramatic Art.

Career

At the age of 17, Ready played Romeo in the National Youth Theatre production of _Romeo and Juliet_ at London's Bloomsbury Theatre, opposite Rosamund Pike as Juliet.

He is a regular at the National and Royal Court theatres. Recent appearances have included leading parts in _Major Barbara_ and _Saint Joan_ (both plays by George Bernard Shaw) and _Time and the Conways_. His West End credits include _One Flew Over the Cuckoo's Nest_ which starred Christian Slater. His most recent theatre role was Macbeth at the Sam Wanamaker Playhouse (2018), opposite his wife Michelle Terry as Lady Macbeth. For his role as Macbeth, the _Financial Times_ said: “Ready is a rare bird in that he has an actorly way with oratory, but instead of keeping us at a distance from his character, it clarifies nuances and levels and paradoxically allows us in deeper.”[4]

Also appearing on television, Ready received notability in 2013 for his role in the television show _Utopia_. He is best-known for his role as the special adviser to Keeley Hawes’s Home Secretary in BBC series _Bodyguard_, and Kevin in BBC series _Motherland_.

In 2018, he featured as Henry Goodsir, one of the lead roles in _The Terror_, a 10-part series based on Dan Simmons' best-selling novel.[5] _Vanity Fair_ said of his performance: “Ready’s character is the heart of the show: despite the various calamities that have befallen him and his comrades, he still sees hope. This purity of spirit, as well as Ready’s tremendous performance, makes it all the more wrenching when he dies.”[6]

Personal life

Ready is married to actress and writer Michelle Terry. They have one daughter.

Filmography

-   _Angels and Insects_ (1995) - Tom
-   _Maybe Baby_ (2000) - Student Doctor
-   _Tipping the Velvet_ (2002, TV Mini-Series) - Renter Alice
-   _Pierrepoint_ (2005) - Anthony David Farrow
-   _Holby City_ (2006, TV Series) - Leon Harris
-   _National Theatre Live: London Assurance_ (2010) - Charles Courtly
-   _Private Peaceful_ (2012) - Captain Wilkins
-   _Sword of Honour_ (2013, radio)
-   _The Tunnel_ (2013, TV Series) - Benji Robertson
-   _Utopia_ (2013-2014, TV Series) - Lee
-   _Ripper Street_ (2013-2016, TV Series) - Frederick Treves
-   _The Once and Future King_ (2014, BBC Radio 4)
-   _Cuffs_ (2015, TV Mini-Series) - DI Felix Kane
-   _Home Front_ (2016, BBC Radio 4)
-   _The Circuit_ (2016, TV Movie) - Danny
-   _Motherland_ (2016-2019, BBC TV) - Kevin
-   _Fortitude_ (2017, Sky Atlantic) - Mark Devlin
-   _The Death of Stalin_ (2017) - NKVD Officer Delov
-   _The Terror_ (2018, TV Series) - Henry Goodsir
-   _Bodyguard_ (2018, BBC TV) - Rob

Theatre

-   _Mother Clap's Molly House_ (2001–2002)
-   _Romeo and Juliet_ (2002)
-   _Crazyblackmuthafuckin'self_ (2002)
-   _Waves_ (2006)
-   _Attempts on her Life_ (2007)
-   _Saint Joan_ (2007)
-   _Time and the Conways_ (2009)
-   _London Assurance_ (2010)
-   _A Woman Killed with Kindness_ (2011)[7]
-   _Noises Off_ (2011–2012)[8]
-   _Much Ado About Nothing_ (Royal Exchange, Manchester, 2014)
-   _Macbeth_ (Sam Wanamaker Playhouse, 2018-2019)

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title: Paul Ready

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about Paul Ready's theatre career?

answer: Ready has played Romeo in a National Youth Theatre production and Shakespearean roles in several other productions, including _Saint Joan_. In recent years, he has made appearances in several theatre productions, including _Crazyblackmuthafuckin'self_ and _Macbeth_, and has had significant roles in several television series.

answer: The Financial Times praised Ready's performance in Dead in the Death of Stalin. Ready's London Assurance production the following year was well received by other publications, as well. Aside from that, Ready and his wife Michelle Terry performed in "Motherwell" in 2002 and Juliet, another Shakespeare production, in 2002. He played in "Time and the Conways" in 2009 and "Macbeth" in 2019.

text: There are a lot of inaccurate facts written in this response, and this response needs to be re-written. Ready played in Macbeth with his wife, not in Juliet.

refinement: Ready has played Romeo in a National Youth Theatre production and Shakespearean roles in several other productions, including _Saint Joan_. In recent years, he has made appearances in several theatre productions, including _Crazyblackmuthafuckin'self_ and _Macbeth_, and has had significant roles in several television series.

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Since 1995, Ready has played in six stage productions. Three years later in 1998, he appeared in another play, "Romeo and Juliet". Quickly thereafter in 2002, Ready acted in another play, "Crazyblackmuthafuckin'self". Beyond these ten years, Ready continued to act in plays including: "Sain John", "Henry Goodsir", "Macbeth" and "Noises Off".
- "Motherland" (2016- 2019), "#Bodyguard" (2018), "Macbeth at the Sam Wanamaker Playhouse" (2018), and "Lord of the Rings" (2019).

text: The first sentence of this response is incorrect. The dates are also incorrect in this response and Ready was not in Lord of the Rings.

refinement:
Since 1995, Ready has played in several stage productions. In 2002, he appeared in another play, "Romeo and Juliet". Quickly thereafter in 2002, Ready acted in another play, "Crazyblackmuthafuckin'self". Beyond these ten years, Ready continued to act in plays including: "Sain John", "Henry Goodsir", "Macbeth" and "Noises Off".
- "Motherland" (2016- 2019), "#Bodyguard" (2018), and "Macbeth at the Sam Wanamaker Playhouse" (2018)

answer: He's an accomplished theatre actor, having started his career at age 17. He regularly performs at the National and Royal Court theatres.  His notable plays include George Bernard Shaw's plays "Major Barbara" and "Saint Joan", and his latest appearance is in "Macbeth". Ready is praised for his role in Macbeth; Financial Times says his oratory skills clarify nuances in his acting and draws the audience in.

answer: The article discusses Ready's theatre career primarily in relation to roles he played as Romeo at the Bloomsbury Theatre and Macbeth at the Sam Wanamaker Playhouse. Ready has also played roles in a number of stage productions, including _Mother Clap's Molly House_, _Romeo and Juliet_, _Crazyblackmuthafuckin'self_, and _Time and the Conways_. In addition, Ready has taken on leading roles in _Saint Joan_ and _Macbeth_, both by George Bernard Shaw.

text: The last sentence in this response is incorrect.

refinement: The article discusses Ready's theatre career primarily in relation to roles he played as Romeo at the Bloomsbury Theatre and Macbeth at the Sam Wanamaker Playhouse. Ready has also played roles in a number of stage productions, including _Mother Clap's Molly House_, _Romeo and Juliet_, _Crazyblackmuthafuckin'self_, and _Time and the Conways_. In addition, Ready has taken on leading roles in Major Barbara and Saint Joan, both by George Bernard Shaw.


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This is a repost of a small stand-alone excerpt that I submitted last night with some formatting issues. It was my first ever reddit post and thanks to a friendly comment I believe I have addressed the issues. Hopefully this version will be more legible, thanks again for reading! - side note - this is somewhat of a practice exercise for me as I haven't written anything in quite a while. I wanted to fiddle around with some duplicitous layering

Just south of a small mountain range, a cool spring breeze passed through a stone monastery. The overgrown ivy covering the northern face of the building danced as the wind tickled its bountiful growth. From the top of the smooth cut stone structure the ivy had crept to meet the rocky cliff face upon which the monastery was perched. Green ivy, grey rock, and beige stone lay against a backdrop of deep, clear blue, as the sky was brimming with colour at the onset of the new season. The monastery was a large, square compound, with four stone parapets at each corner of the building, the northernmost being flush against the cliff face. At the centre was a circular courtyard, filled with beds of flowers and shrubs around the perimeter of the courtyard. Forming this perimeter were a series of stone pillars, the bases of which were buried beneath the lush green of the plants. Atop one of the pillars was a nest of sparrows, and the birds fluttered around the courtyard, singing cheerfully.

That friendly mountain breeze made its way into the courtyard, towards a simple wooden bench that faced the mild warmth of the afternoon sun. It brushed aside the hem of a white robe, cooling the ankles of the monk sitting alone on the bench. He was an old man, whose ample belly was poorly disguised by his simple clothes, yet his face had retained its youthful glow, enhanced by his bald pate gleaming in the sunlight. His eyes squinted against the sun as he smiled contentedly, listening to the sparrows’ concert and taking in the fresh growth of greenery. His smile widened as he heard the faint clapping of sandaled feet on stone tiles. The dim sound grew in resonance as the footsteps approached, and from his seat on the bench the monk called out cheerfully,

“Good afternoon, Brother,”

The newcomer emerged from within the monastery, coming into view, similarly clothed in a white habit, yet a bit younger than his colleague. Unlike the seated monk, he was quite thin, and though he was not smiling, he had an honest, open face.

“May I join you?”

“Of course! Please sit.”

The slender monk then held up the jug and two cups he had been holding, and smiled faintly, to which the older monk laughed and patted him on the shoulder as he lowered himself onto the bench.

“I suppose it is never too early to celebrate such a fine day” he said.

The second man carefully poured a cup of red wine, and passed it to his companion, after which he poured himself a cup. For several minutes they both sat in silence, sipping their wine and admiring the courtyard and its garden. Finally, the thinner monk placed his cup on the ground next to the jug of wine, and fixed his gaze on the heavyset monk.

“The vote is tomorrow, the monastery is in a furor, it is quite a nuisance.”

The older monk chuckled and returned the look, “I have been through many such votes, and this is by far the most tiresome of them all.”

Not known for outbursts of laughter, the younger monk gave a hearty grin, flashing what teeth he had left before remarking, “We are priests, not politicians, my friend. I should say this is ill befitting our station. Such ambition is better left to the less morally inclined.”

In response his companion simply smiled, looked down at his cup, and took a sip, his light grey eyes surveying the wine like a hawk watched a rabbit. The younger man likewise took a sip, his eyes watching his friend as he swallowed the warm red liquid.

“Brother,” he said, smiling, “I’m afraid you’ve besmirched your habit.”

The larger monk stared at him, watching his eyes and his smug expression as he slowly reached his arm towards his friend’s throat, only to gently place his slender finger upon a red stain at the collar of the robe. The culprit was not hidden, as a line of red was visible on the large monk’s cup from where the wine had spilled.

Breaking eye contact and looking down at his lap, the bald man laughed, tut-tutting to himself, “That won’t do at all,” he said.

“Yes,” his friend said slowly, looking at the patch of red, “that stain must be removed.”

“Or perhaps, I could simply find a way to hide it,” he said as he watched the thin man, “with so many habits and so many monks, I’m sure there are more than a few concealed stains amongst our ranks.”

The skinny monk’s face bore an expression of sincere contemplation as his eyes bored into the large monk’s robe, “Perhaps,” he said.

He reached down to collect the jug and his own cup, rising from the bench. His robe had gone into disarray, and he quietly adjusted it before turning back towards the older monk. They shared a warm smile as each stared at the other, with the hefty monk raising his cup in front of his sharp grey eyes as he said through grinning teeth, “My thanks, for the drink, Brother.”

The thin man nodded to him, and headed for the interior of the monastery, his sandals playing the same song against the stone that they had when he approached, only this time in reverse. As the song faded to nothing, the solitary monk once more perked his eyes and ears toward the chattering sparrows.

The sun was still out, the sky was still blue, the garden was still radiant, and the birds still sang. As he finished his wine, the monk contemplated the one thing he knew with certainty on that beautiful day. For himself, or the man who just left, there would be no sun, no sky, no garden, no birds, no wine, waiting for them tomorrow. Only death. He decided then that he had not yet had his fill of such marvelous spring days.

	“Now then,” he said, laboriously rising from the bench, “I suppose I should see about removing this stain.”

title: [FN] The White Habit

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the biggest point of contention in the story.

answer: The biggest point of contention in the story is the vote that the monks have to make. The older monk is looking forward to the vote, but the younger monk isn't. The vote is about whether or not to accept a newcomer. The younger monk is concerned about the vote because it is the most tiresome one they have had.

text: Extraneous information.

refinement: The biggest point of contention in the story is the vote that the monks have to make.

answer: The biggest point of contention in the story is the vote. The vote is tomorrow and the monastery is in a furor. The vote is the biggest point of contention because it is the only thing being talked about. The vote is for the abbot.

text: "The vote is for the abbot." - this is speculative.

refinement: The biggest point of contention in the story is the vote. The vote is tomorrow and the monastery is in a furor. The vote is the biggest point of contention because it is the only thing being talked about.

answer: The biggest point of contention in the story is the vote. The vote is tomorrow and the monastery is in a furor. The vote is the biggest point of contention because it is the only thing being talked about.

answer: The biggest point of contention in the story is the vote for the monastery. It is the source of tension between the two monks. The vote is tomorrow, and the monastery is in a furor. The younger monk believes that the vote is ill befitting of their station. He believes ambition is better left to less morally inclined people. The older monk believes that the vote is a nuisance.

text: "the vote for the monastery" - this is inaccurate. The monks weren't voting "for the monastery". It's just a vote.

refinement: The biggest point of contention in the story is the vote. It is the source of tension between the two monks. The vote is tomorrow, and the monastery is in a furor. The younger monk believes that the vote is ill befitting of their station. He believes ambition is better left to less morally inclined people. The older monk believes that the vote is a nuisance.

text: "It is the source of tension between the two monks." - the two monks share a drink and they both agree that the vote is a tiresome nuisance, so there isn't much tension there.

refinement: The biggest point of contention in the story is the vote. The vote is tomorrow, and the monastery is in a furor. The younger monk believes that the vote is ill befitting of their station. He believes ambition is better left to less morally inclined people. The older monk believes that the vote is a nuisance.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Explain the meaning and/or symbolism of the wine stain on the monk's habit.

answer: The wine stain on the monk's habit is symbolic of the blood that will stain his hands when he commits the murder of the other monk.

text: There wasn't any indication that the monk was going to murder the other monk.

refinement: The wine stain on the monk's habit is symbolic

text: The response is missing the symbolism of the wine stain.

refinement: The wine stain on the monk's habit is symbolic of the stain on a person's character. It means that not all monks are pure and a few are hiding something. It appears some of the monks want to clean up their ranks and remove the monks that have character stains, but the act could cause bloodshed and death.

answer: The wine stain on the monk's habit symbolizes the death of the monk and the fact that tomorrow he will be dead. The wine stain is a symbol of the monk's mortality.

text: "the death of the monk and the fact that tomorrow he will be dead. The wine stain is a symbol of the monk's mortality." - this is incorrect. The stain symbolizes the fact that not all men, monks included, are good people, and some harbor secrets.

refinement: The wine stain on the monk's habit symbolizes

text: Add the missing details about what the wine stain symbolizes.

refinement: The wine stain on the monk's habit symbolizes the imperfection of all men, monks included. In the story, it seems that a few monks have "stains" on their character which they try to hide, but another group of monks who see themselves as unblemished by mortal stain want to rid the monastery of monks with something to hide.

answer: The wine stain on the monk's habit is symbolic of the blood that will stain his hands when he commits the murder of the other monk. This can be seen as a metaphor for the corruption of the church.

answer: The wine stain symbolizes the monk's impending death.

text: The wine stain symbolizes more than death. It symbolizes the imperfection of man, monks included, and that men try to conceal their stains.

refinement: The wine stain symbolizes that not all monks are pure and a few are hiding something. It appears some of the monks want to clean up their ranks and remove the monks that have character stains, but the act could cause bloodshed and death.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize what the vote is.

answer: No answer

answer: The vote is not given specific details, but it seems to be regarding the debate within the monastery. The true meaning of the vote can be gleaned from the pre-agreement between the two monks. It is likely they are to vote on "death."

text: "The true meaning of the vote can be gleaned from the pre-agreement between the two monks. It is likely they are to vote on "death." - this wasn't mentioned in the text.

refinement: The vote is not given specific details, but it seems to be regarding the debate within the monastery.

answer: The monks behind it is unclear, but it seems negative.

text: "monks" - this should be replaced with "reason"

refinement: The reason behind it is unclear, but it seems negative.

answer: The monastery is in a furor and the vote is tomorrow. The slender man discusses that they are both priests and are not interested in being politicians. The vote is something they have both experienced many times and is not suitable for their station. It must be something that lowly monks do. There is a concern that there are others just like them in the order. That someone is giving it a bad name. The other monks are trying to vote the person out.

text: The highlighted text is extraneous and should be removed.

refinement: The monastery is in a furor and the vote is tomorrow. The slender man discusses that they are both priests and are not interested in being politicians. The vote is something they have both experienced many times and is not suitable for their station. It must be something that lowly monks do.

answer: The vote is something they have both experienced many times and is not suitable for their station. It must be something that lowly monks do. There is a concern that there are others just like them in the order. That someone is giving it a bad name.

text: The highlighted text is extraneous and should be removed.

refinement: The vote is something they have both experienced many times and is not suitable for their station. It must be something that lowly monks do.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the differences between the two monks.

answer: The narrator monk is older and larger, seen as benevolent towards his partner. The narrator is possibly dying. Alternatively, the younger monk is described as ambitious with a smug attitude and this can be read as a negative way.

text: "The narrator" - this is inaccurate because the narrator is separate from the two monks and is merely a storyteller. Replace this with "The first".

refinement: The first monk is older and larger, seen as benevolent towards his partner. The narrator is possibly dying. Alternatively, the younger monk is described as ambitious with a smug attitude and this can be read as a negative way.

text: "The narrator is possibly dying." - this is inaccurate because there is no narrator and there was no indication that anyone (or the older monk) was dying.

refinement: The first monk is older and larger, seen as benevolent towards his partner. Alternatively, the younger monk is described as ambitious with a smug attitude and this can be read as a negative way.

text: There was no mention of the younger monk being ambitious. This part of the response should be revised.

refinement: The first monk is older and larger, seen as benevolent towards his partner. Alternatively, the younger monk is thin, smug, and rarely smiles.

answer: The older monk, who we learn is the Abbot, is more of the jovial type. He drinks the red wine, but has scant regard for his habit. The younger monk is more of the stern, meditative type who, more often than not, prefers to not imbibe. The younger monk is a bit more moralistic, possibly a parallel to the type of life people choose as monks versus that of layperson.

text: "who we learn is the Abbot," -  this was never established and should be removed.

refinement: The older monk is more of the jovial type. He drinks the red wine, but has scant regard for his habit. The younger monk is more of the stern, meditative type who, more often than not, prefers to not imbibe. The younger monk is a bit more moralistic, possibly a parallel to the type of life people choose as monks versus that of layperson.

text: This part of the response is inaccurate. There was no mention of the younger monk being the stern, meditative type. He also prefers to imbibe because he brought the wine. The was also no indication that the older monk had scant disregard for his habit. Everything should be removed.

refinement: The older monk is more of the jovial type.

text: Add the missing details about the differences between the two monks.

refinement: The older monk is more of the jovial type, is bald, and has an ample belly. The younger monk is thinner and seldom smiles. He is also smug, but has an honest face,

answer: The older monk is more jovial, soft in nature. Whereas the younger monk is more stern but not unfriendly. The older monk is content to bask in the sun in contrast to the younger monk, who sees this as hedonism and is more the concerned sort. The younger monk is slightly moralistic - some parallels to the real-life example of the Catholic Church's vocation.

text: The highlighted text was never mentioned anywhere in the story and should be removed.

text: The response is missing the difference between the two monks.

refinement: The older monk is more jovial, heavyset, had an ample belly, bald, and retained his youthful glow. The other monk was a bit younger, thinner, smug, and doesn't smile, but had an honest, open face.

answer: The first monk is a bit older, and more experienced with the politics of their monastery, as he's sipped from the cup.

text: "and more experienced with the politics of their monastery, as he's sipped from the cup." - this is incorrect because it was never established.

text: The response is missing details about the differences between the two monks.

refinement: The first monk is a bit older, more jovial, heavyset, had an ample belly, bald, and retained his youthful glow. The other monk was a bit younger, thinner, smug, and doesn't smile, but had an honest, open face.


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WILLIAM SMITH (portrayed by Will Smith) is a fictionalized version of Smith and main character in the NBC television series _The Fresh Prince of Bel-Air_.

Concept and characteristics

The character of Will Smith is loosely based on the life of Warner Bros. Executive Benny Medina as well as the actor that plays him of the same name (although in the show 'Will' is short for William, while in real life it is short for Willard). Smith's charming and mischievous personality earned him the nickname “Prince,” which eventually became “Fresh Prince”. Smith had become a successful rapper, but lost most of his money because of poor budgeting. When NBC signed Smith up for the sitcom, he was almost bankrupt, and it immediately launched his acting career.[1]

Background

The premise of the character of Will, and of the show in general, is outlined in the opening theme. Will is a street-smart and laid-back West Philadelphia teenager. After Will gets into a fight his mother sends him to live with his wealthy aunt and uncle (Vivian and Phillip Banks) in Bel-Air.[2][3]

Storyline

Following Will's arrival in Bel-Air, he was a great distance from home and was considered an outsider by many people in his Bel-Air neighborhood. Early on, he had a picture of Malcolm X on his wall. He often disagrees with his cousin Carlton, whom he sees as not quite “black” enough because he doesn't talk like other young African Americans. While Smith sometimes perceives Phil as being overprotective of Ashley, he himself also can be; when Ashley asks him about sex, Will became shocked by Ashley's inquiry, which leads him and Carlton to go to a clinic to talk to a doctor about how to discuss sex with Ashley. His father, Lou, who had abandoned him at childhood, returns in the episode “Papa's Got A Brand New Excuse.” His dad promises to take him on the road with him, but later drops Will, and the resulting disappointment breaks Will’s heart. It is then that Smith tearfully realizes Philip is the closest thing he had to a father.

Though Will often teases his Uncle Phillip due to his obesity, he genuinely values Phillip as a father figure and fiercely defends him when his image or integrity is attacked by outsiders, especially in season 3's “Asses to Ashes.” In the episode, “Bullets Over Bel-Air,” Will is shot at a bank ATM while protecting Carlton from a robber. Carlton then feels that Will could have died saving him. During one of Will's visits back to his old neighborhood in Philly, he confronts the old park thug, Omar, to restore his damaged reputation. When Will challenges him, he is startled when a reformed Omar refuses to fight back. Omar shuns Will, and through him, Will gradually realizes that his reputation is not important.

Similar to his relationship with Uncle Phil is his relationship with his cousin Carlton. Though he often mocks Carlton mercilessly over his preppy nature, lack of “street cred”, and generally uncool nature, he is also fiercely protective of Carlton and will not hesitate to come to his cousin's defense. As stated previously, he even went so far as to take a bullet for Carlton. In another episode, Will quits a black fraternity when they refuse to let Carlton in for not being “black” enough. Will’s loyalty and love for Carlton are not lost on the latter, and in the final episode Carlton outright tells Will “Thank you for being the brother I always wanted.”.

At the conclusion of the show's run, the Banks family decides to settle in New York, while Will remains in Los Angeles to finish his last year of college. Will eventually becomes a close member of the Banks family and a better man by the series' end. Will delivers the last line of dialogue in the series: “I am definitely going to miss you, C.”

Reception

The character and Will Smith's portrayal received near unanimous praise from television critics & audiences alike. UGO editor Bryan Enk praised Will Smith's role as the character, stating “Rarely has there been a television series so perfectly tailor-made for its star than _The Fresh Prince of Bel-Air_ [...] _Fresh Prince_ fit Will Smith like a glove; it was obviously a showcase for him, but his co-stars were just as good, and Smith never hogged the spotlight (or the camera), allowing each cast member to shine in every episode.”[4]

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[2] Season 1, episode 1 _The Fresh Prince Project_

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title: Will Smith (The Fresh Prince of Bel-Air)

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize Will's relationship with his family.

answer: He often has disagreements with his cousin Carlton but is fiercely protective of him at the same time. He can also be overprotective of Ashley at times. He was abandoned by his father as a child. Though Will teases his Uncle Phillip, he values Phillip as a father figure and doesn't hesitate to jump to his defense.

text: Missing the detail about Will's mother.

refinement: He often has disagreements with his cousin Carlton but is fiercely protective of him at the same time. He can also be overprotective of Ashley at times. As for Will's parents, he was abandoned by his father as a child and his mother sent him to live with his Uncle Philip (and Aunt Vivian) after they had a big fight. Though Will teases his Uncle Phillip, he values Phillip as a father figure and doesn't hesitate to jump to his defense.

answer: Will only considers Vivian, Phillip, and Ashley to be a part of his family. Barclay isn't part of his family, but he perceives Earl as one of his his.

text: "Barclay isn't part of his family, but he perceives Earl as one of his his." - this line doesn't exist anywhere in the text.

refinement: Will only considers Vivian, Phillip, and Ashley to be a part of his family.

text: "Will only considers Vivian, Phillip, and Ashley to be a part of his family." - this is inaccurate. Will eventually becomes a close member of the Banks family.

refinement: Will doesn't seem to have a healthy relationship with his own parents. His father abandoned him and broke his heart as a kid, while his mother sent him away to live with the Banks in Bel-Air after they had a big fight. Will eventually becomes a close member of the Banks family and is fiercely protective of them, taking a bullet for his cousin Carlton and defending his Uncle Philip's integrity when attacked by outsiders. Will values Philip as a father figure and is like a brother to Carlton.

answer: Will Smith's relationship with his family is primarily with his uncle Phillip, who serves as a father figure for him. Will is fiercely protective of both Phillip and his cousin Carlton and is also protective of Carlton even though he often teases him. Will values his relationship with his uncle and cousin and eventually settles in New York at the end of the show's run.

text: "and is also protective of Carlton" - redundant. Should be removed.

refinement: Will Smith's relationship with his family is primarily with his uncle Phillip, who serves as a father figure for him. Will is fiercely protective of both Phillip and his cousin Carlton even though he often teases him. Will values his relationship with his uncle and cousin and eventually settles in New York at the end of the show's run.

text: "eventually settles in New York at the end of the show's run" - this is incorrect. The Banks settle in New York, but Will stays behind in Los Angeles to finish his last year of college.

refinement: Will Smith's relationship with his family is primarily with his uncle Phillip, who serves as a father figure for him. Will is fiercely protective of both Phillip and his cousin Carlton even though he often teases him. Will values his relationship with his uncle and cousin but had to stay in Los Angeles when the Banks family settled in New York so he can finish his last year of college.

text: Missing details about Will's own family.

refinement: Will Smith's relationship with his family is primarily with his uncle Phillip, who serves as a father figure for him. Will is fiercely protective of both Phillip and his cousin Carlton even though he often teases him. Will values his relationship with his uncle and cousin but had to stay in Los Angeles when the Banks family settled in New York so he can finish his last year of college. He eventually becomes a close member of the Banks family. Will's relationship with his own family is non-existent. His dad abandoned him when he was a kid and his mom sent him away to live with the Banks in Los Angeles after they had a fight.

answer: Coming from West Philly there is strong friction with his cousin Carlton and his Uncle Phillip. However Will is fiercely protective of both and when Carlton talked to Will about sex Will did not see a pervert but his friend that needed advice. His father reappears in “Papa Got a Brand New Excuse” this creates a cheery for Will, but his father disappoints him. Will and Uncle Phillip eventually develop a good relationship, especially when Will defends him from outsiders.

text: Add a comma to "However"

refinement: Coming from West Philly there is strong friction with his cousin Carlton and his Uncle Phillip. However, Will is fiercely protective of both and when Carlton talked to Will about sex Will did not see a pervert but his friend that needed advice. His father reappears in “Papa Got a Brand New Excuse” this creates a cheery for Will, but his father disappoints him. Will and Uncle Phillip eventually develop a good relationship, especially when Will defends him from outsiders.

text: "and when Carlton talked to Will about sex Will did not see a pervert but his friend that needed advice." - this never happened. It was Ashley who asked about sex.

refinement: Coming from West Philly there is strong friction with his cousin Carlton and his Uncle Phillip. However, Will is fiercely protective of both. His father reappears in “Papa Got a Brand New Excuse” this creates a cheery for Will, but his father disappoints him. Will and Uncle Phillip eventually develop a good relationship, especially when Will defends him from outsiders.

text: "this creates a cheery for Will" -  this line doesn't make any sense.

refinement: Coming from West Philly there is strong friction with his cousin Carlton and his Uncle Phillip. However, Will is fiercely protective of both. His father reappears in “Papa Got a Brand New Excuse”, but his father disappoints him. Will and Uncle Phillip eventually develop a good relationship, especially when Will defends him from outsiders.

answer: Will is the main character of _The Fresh Prince of Bel-Air_ and has a close relationship with his aunt and uncle, Vivian and Phillip Banks. While he often teases his uncle due to his obesity, Will also views him as a father figure. Will is fiercely protective of both his cousin Carlton and uncle Phil. He values their relationship, even risking his own safety for them. Will also had a difficult relationship with his father, Lou, who abandoned him at a young age. However, though their relationship was strained, it gradually improved over the course of the series. By the show's end, Will remained in Los Angeles while the Banks family decided to move to New York.

text: "uncle" - change spelling to "Uncle"

refinement: Will is the main character of _The Fresh Prince of Bel-Air_ and has a close relationship with his aunt and uncle, Vivian and Phillip Banks. While he often teases his uncle due to his obesity, Will also views him as a father figure. Will is fiercely protective of both his cousin Carlton and Uncle Phil. He values their relationship, even risking his own safety for them. Will also had a difficult relationship with his father, Lou, who abandoned him at a young age. However, though their relationship was strained, it gradually improved over the course of the series. By the show's end, Will remained in Los Angeles while the Banks family decided to move to New York.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the inspiration for the character.

answer: Will Smith is loosely based on the life of a Warner Bros. executive. He is also the actor who portrayed the character. He lost a lot of his money because of poor budgeting, so NBC signed him up for the show.

text: "He lost a lot of his money because of poor budgeting, so NBC signed him up for the show." - this is irrelevant and should be removed.

refinement: Will Smith is loosely based on the life of a Warner Bros. executive. He is also the actor who portrayed the character.

text: "Will Smith is loosely based on the life of a Warner Bros. executive. He is also the actor who portrayed the character." - this is inaccurate. William Smith is the character and will Smith played him on screen.

refinement: "William "Will" Smith" is loosely based on the life of Warner Bors. Executive Benny Medina and a fictionalized version of the actor that plays him, who incidentally, shares almost the same name in Willard "Will" Smith. Smith's mischievous and charming personality earned him the nickname "Prince", and the character eventually became "Fresh Prince".

answer: The character of Will Smith is loosely based on Warner Bros. Executive Benny Medina. Smith's charming and mischievous personality earned him the nickname “Prince” which later became “Fresh Prince.” Smith had become a successful rapper, but lost most of his money because of poor budgeting when NBC signed him up for the sitcom. The premise of the character involves Will moving to Bel-Air to live with his wealthy aunt and uncle; in Bel-Air, Will initially was considered an outsider but eventually he became close with his family through loyalty, love, and selflessness.

text: "Smith had become a successful rapper, but lost most of his money because of poor budgeting when NBC signed him up for the sitcom. The premise of the character involves Will moving to Bel-Air to live with his wealthy aunt and uncle; in Bel-Air, Will initially was considered an outsider but eventually he became close with his family through loyalty, love, and selflessness." - this is irrelevant and should be removed.

refinement: The character of Will Smith is loosely based on Warner Bros. Executive Benny Medina. Smith's charming and mischievous personality earned him the nickname “Prince” which later became “Fresh Prince.”

text: The response is missing some details about Will Smith.

refinement: The character of William Smith is loosely based on Warner Bros. Executive Benny Medina and a fictionalized version of the actor that plays him of the same name, Will Smith. Smith's charming and mischievous personality earned him the nickname “Prince” which later became “Fresh Prince.”

answer: The character is based on both Will Smith himself and on Benny Medina, an executive as Warner Bros. Even the name "Prince" comes from a nickname for Will Smith.

text: "as" - change to "at"

refinement: The character is based on both Will Smith himself and on Benny Medina, an executive at Warner Bros. Even the name "Prince" comes from a nickname for Will Smith.

answer: The character of Will Smith, better known as the "Prince", is loosely based on a Warner Bros. executive named Benny Medina and on actor Will Smith. Smith's personality and backstory function as the basis for the character; Will is depicted as a street-smart and laid-back West Philadelphia teenager who moves in with his privileged aunt and uncle in Bel-Air after getting into a fight. Smith was inspired by Medina and Smith's real-life rap career loss. Will is depicted as loyal to family, especially to his uncle Phillip, and fiercely defends his image or integrity if necessary. Despite some disagreements with his cousin Carlton, Will is fiercely protective of him. Finally, the last line of dialogue in the series is delivered by the Prince himself.

text: "Smith's personality and backstory function as the basis for the character;" - this is inaccurate. Smith's personality inspired the character, but his backstory did not.

refinement: The character of Will Smith, better known as the "Prince", is loosely based on a Warner Bros. executive named Benny Medina and on actor Will Smith and his personality. Will is depicted as a street-smart and laid-back West Philadelphia teenager who moves in with his privileged aunt and uncle in Bel-Air after getting into a fight. Smith was inspired by Medina and Smith's real-life rap career loss. Will is depicted as loyal to family, especially to his uncle Phillip, and fiercely defends his image or integrity if necessary. Despite some disagreements with his cousin Carlton, Will is fiercely protective of him. Finally, the last line of dialogue in the series is delivered by the Prince himself.

text: The highlighted text is irrelevant and should be deleted.

refinement: The character of Will Smith, better known as the "Prince", is loosely based on a Warner Bros. executive named Benny Medina and on actor Will Smith and his personality.

answer: MD,the character is loosely based on Benny Medina and Will Smith.

text: "MD," - this doesn't make sense and should not be here.

refinement: The character is loosely based on Benny Medina and Will Smith.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the negative events that happen to Will over the course of the show.

answer: Will's father Lou leaves him at a young age and fools him into going to college and tells him he will be back, but doesn't return. Will's name is then insulted, and he loses a thousand dollars at one of the casinos he gambles in because the banks were by closed. Will then has a fight with a street thug who points a gun at Will, and a few seasons later, he is shot at a bank to protect Carlton.

text: "and fools him into going to college" - this is incorrect and should be removed.

refinement: Will's father Lou leaves him at a young age and tells him he will be back, but doesn't return. Will's name is then insulted, and he loses a thousand dollars at one of the casinos he gambles in because the banks were by closed. Will then has a fight with a street thug who points a gun at Will, and a few seasons later, he is shot at a bank to protect Carlton.

text: "Will's name is then insulted, and he loses a thousand dollars at one of the casinos he gambles in because the banks were by closed. Will then has a fight with a street thug who points a gun at Will, and a few seasons later," - this never happened and should be removed.

refinement: Will's father Lou leaves him at a young age and tells him he will be back, but doesn't return. he is shot at a bank to protect Carlton.

text: "he is shot at a bank to protect Carlton." - incomplete sentence.

refinement: Will's father Lou leaves him at a young age and tells him he will be back, but doesn't return. Will is shot at a bank ATM while protecting Carlton from a robber.

text: Missing several negative events that happened to Will.

refinement: Will's father Lou leaves him at a young age and tells him he will be back, but doesn't return. Will is shot at a bank ATM while protecting Carlton from a robber. He got into a fight with his mom and was sent to live in Los Angeles, taking him away from his friends. He often disagrees with Carlton. Will was considered an outsider when he first arrived in Bel-Air. His reputation in Philadelphia got damaged at some point.

answer: Will gets into a fight with his cousin and ends up moving to Bel Air. His father returns in "Papa's Got a Brand New Excuse" and promises to take him on the road, but drops Will. He is shot at a bank ATM. In "Bullets over Bel-Air", Will confronts the old park thug and realizes his reputation is not important. Will ends up deciding to stay in Los Angeleas instead of returning to Philly to finish college, which will presumably stick with him should the show get picked up again.

text: "Will gets into a fight with his cousin and ends up moving to Bel Air." - this is incorrect. Will got into a fight with his mother and she sends him to Bel-Air.

refinement: Will gets into a fight with his mother, so she sends him away to Bel Air. His father returns in "Papa's Got a Brand New Excuse" and promises to take him on the road, but drops Will. He is shot at a bank ATM. In "Bullets over Bel-Air", Will confronts the old park thug and realizes his reputation is not important. Will ends up deciding to stay in Los Angeleas instead of returning to Philly to finish college, which will presumably stick with him should the show get picked up again.

text: "In "Bullets over Bel-Air"," - the title's placement is incorrect and should be removed.

refinement: Will gets into a fight with his mother, so she sends him away to Bel Air. His father returns in "Papa's Got a Brand New Excuse" and promises to take him on the road, but drops Will. He is shot at a bank ATM. Will confronts the old park thug and realizes his reputation is not important. Will ends up deciding to stay in Los Angeleas instead of returning to Philly to finish college, which will presumably stick with him should the show get picked up again.

text: "Angeleas" - change to "Angeles"

refinement: Will gets into a fight with his mother, so she sends him away to Bel Air. His father returns in "Papa's Got a Brand New Excuse" and promises to take him on the road, but drops Will. He is shot at a bank ATM. Will confronts the old park thug and realizes his reputation is not important. Will ends up deciding to stay in Los Angeles instead of returning to Philly to finish college, which will presumably stick with him should the show get picked up again.

text: Add a little more backstory to Will's dad because it is one of the worst things to happen.

refinement: Will gets into a fight with his mother, so she sends him away to Bel Air. His father Lou, who abandoned Will when he was a kid, returns in "Papa's Got a Brand New Excuse" and promises to take him on the road, but drops Will and breaks his heart. He is shot at a bank ATM. Will confronts the old park thug and realizes his reputation is not important. Will ends up deciding to stay in Los Angeles instead of returning to Philly to finish college, which will presumably stick with him should the show get picked up again.

text: "Will confronts the old park thug and realizes his reputation is not important." - Will having a damaged reputation is more negative.

refinement: Will gets into a fight with his mother, so she sends him away to Bel Air. His father Lou, who abandoned Will when he was a kid, returns in "Papa's Got a Brand New Excuse" and promises to take him on the road, but drops Will and breaks his heart. He is shot at a bank ATM. Will's reputation in Philadephia was damaged at one point. Will ends up deciding to stay in Los Angeles instead of returning to Philly to finish college, which will presumably stick with him should the show get picked up again.

text: "Will ends up deciding to stay in Los Angeles instead of returning to Philly to finish college" - this is incorrect and not even a negative event. Will stays in Los Angeles when the Banks move to NY to finish college. He was never going back to Philly for college. The last part "which will presumably stick with him should the show get picked up again." - makes no sense.

refinement: Will gets into a fight with his mother, so she sends him away to Bel Air. His father Lou, who abandoned Will when he was a kid, returns in "Papa's Got a Brand New Excuse" and promises to take him on the road, but drops Will and breaks his heart. He is shot at a bank ATM. Will's reputation in Philadephia was damaged at one point.

answer: Will gets into a fight with his mother. He is considered an outsider in Bel-Air. His father promises to take him on a road trip but later abandons him again. Will is shot by a bank robber.

answer: Throughout the course of the show, Will Smith goes through several hardships. He loses most of his money through poor budgeting, has his father abandon him, comes close to dying from a gunshot, and is mocked and criticized by his Cousin Carlton at times. However, despite these events, Will remains a positive and loyal individual.

text: "He loses most of his money through poor budgeting" - this happened to the real Will Smith, not the character he played.

refinement: Throughout the course of the show, Will Smith goes through several hardships. his father abandon him, comes close to dying from a gunshot, and is mocked and criticized by his Cousin Carlton at times. However, despite these events, Will remains a positive and loyal individual.

text: "his father abandon him" - change to "His father abandons him"

refinement: Throughout the course of the show, Will Smith goes through several hardships. His father abandons him, comes close to dying from a gunshot, and is mocked and criticized by his Cousin Carlton at times. However, despite these events, Will remains a positive and loyal individual.

text: "and is mocked and criticized by his Cousin Carlton at times." - this never happened as it was the other way around. Will often mocked ad disagreed with Carlton.

refinement: Throughout the course of the show, Will Smith goes through several hardships. His father abandons him, comes close to dying from a gunshot. However, despite these events, Will remains a positive and loyal individual.

text: " However, despite these events, Will remains a positive and loyal individual." - extraneous information.

refinement: Throughout the course of the show, Will Smith goes through several hardships. His father abandons him, comes close to dying from a gunshot.

text: Missing several key negative events and details.

refinement: Throughout the course of the show, Will Smith goes through several hardships. Will gets into a fight with his mother, who sends him away to Los Angeles. His father, Lou, abandoned him when he was a kid, came back to present-day Will, promised to take Will on the road, but never did. Will was an outsider when he first got to Bel-Air. He often disagrees with Carlton because he doesn't consider his cousin black enough. He gets shot while trying to protect Carlton from a bank robber. Will's reputation in Philly was damaged at some point.

answer: Throughout the run of the show, Will encounters a number of unfortunate events including losing most of his money, his father abandoning him, being shot, and his cousin being excluded from a fraternity even though Will defended Carlton's integrity.


text:
The scene: An idyllic houshold, with no peculiarities. The cast: A traditional nuclear family, living caricatures from a Norman Rockwell piece. The parents make small talk as they all eat a breakfast of bacon and eggs. The children hurriedly scarf down the meal, eager for school. The mother picks up the dishes and together they walk out the door to begin the day. Their footsteps make no noise as they walk on the black dirt where grass grew once upon a time. The father takes a whiff of the toxic, poisonous air and declares it is a fine day as he waves goodbye to his family and begins the trek to work.

The brown and grey pollution that covers the sky shields the land from the scorching sun. The father whistles a tune as he carefully manuvers around the corpses and trash that litter the road. He decides to take the long way since there is yet another traffic jam made up of destroyed cars and fallen buildings.

“Morning, Jim.” He says to no one in particular as he steps into the decrepit office, with holes in the celing and decomposing bodies at the desks.

“Another day another dollar, eh?” He says for the 5,789th time to his cubicle neighbor. He types on the broken keyboard for a few hours, despite the monitor having a cracked, blank screen. Eventually, he gathers up a few  discarded papers, organizes them neatly, and picks up the suitcase he never opened, ready to go home.

“See ya tomor-”

He stops midsentence. Something…isn’t right. “I…uh…morning, Jim…heh…wait. Uh…”

Suddenly, his head feels like someone has hammered a nail into it. He drops his empy suitcase and looks around. The father of two walks around the office, causing the rats to scurry away from their meal.

 “I don’t feel very good…something the wife cooked maybe? Hah…”

A part of him knows there is no one here to talk to. Yet such thoughts feel …wrong. “Of course everyone's here! Richard, you sly dog, you were just over for poker night last week! Right?”

No response of course, yet he has heard his friend speak millions of times before. Why, he wonders, is Richard…and everyone else so quiet today?

 “I need to go home and lie down maybe. Sorry, guys, don’t let my episodes distract you, haha…haha…ha"

He wanders out the doors and begins walking home, forgetting his car. Glass crunches under his shoes in the very old parking lot. Head still hurting, he walks to the charred skeleton of a tree and sits aganist it.

 “What’s wrong with me…feels like everything is falling apart..."

As he tries to relax, he feels something sharp stabbing him. A splinter? He holds his hand up to see a small blue wire protruding from his index finger.

title: Disrepair

question: Who is the main character of the story?

text: There is no answer.

answer: The protagonist is the father, who is going through an undiagnosed mental health crisis.

text: '“I don’t feel very good…something the wife cooked maybe? Hah…” A part of him knows there is no one here to talk to.' is evidence that he has a mental issue.

text: '“What’s wrong with me' implies it is undiagnosed.

text: 'He wanders out the doors and begins walking home, forgetting his car. ' implies he has mental issues.

text: 'He types on the broken keyboard for a few hours, despite the monitor having a cracked, blank screen.' implies he has a mental issue.

answer: The father of a traditional family.

text: It could be more specific.

refinement: The father of a traditional family who has mental issues.

text: 'The father of two walks around the office' is evidence that the story is about the father.

text: 'The cast: A traditional nuclear family' is evidence he is the father of a traditional family.

question: What happens to the father when he is at his office?

answer: The father's coworker notices that something is wrong with him. By the time he leaves, he starts to have a headache.

text: The coworkers are not mentioned.

refinement: By the time he leaves, the father starts to have a headache.

text: It is omitted that the father talks to coworkers and that there is no one to talk to.

refinement: The father talks to coworkers although there is no one to talk to. By the time he leaves, he starts to have a headache.

text: 'Suddenly, his head feels like someone has hammered a nail into it.' is evidence the father has a headache.

answer: He notices that nothing seems to be going right in his environment, including a headache when he tries to concentrate.

text: It is not stated that he has a headache when he tries to concentrate.

refinement: He notices that nothing seems to be going right in his environment, including a headache.

text: '“What’s wrong with me…feels like everything is falling apart..."' implies that he notices that nothing seems to be going right in his environment.

text: 'his head feels like someone has hammered a nail into it' is evidence he has a headache.

answer: He begins to feel sick, with a severe head ache.

text: 'head ache' should be 'headache'

refinement: He begins to feel sick, with a severe headache.

question: Where does the father go when he gets sick?

text: There is no answer.

text: There is no answer.

answer: He begins to walk home, forgetting his car.

text: '“I need to go home and lie down maybe.' is evidence that he is going home

text: 'He wanders out the doors and begins walking home, forgetting his car.' is evidence that he forgets his car.

question: What does the father notice when he tries to relax?

text: There is no answer.

answer: He notices a small blue wire protruding from his index finger.

text: 'As he tries to relax, he feels something sharp stabbing him. A splinter? He holds his hand up to see a small blue wire protruding from his index finger.' supports the answer.

answer: The father notices a blue wire protruding from his index finger.

text: 'As he tries to relax, he feels something sharp stabbing him. A splinter? He holds his hand up to see a small blue wire protruding from his index finger.' supports the answer.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: A family has breakfast together before going about their days. The father arrives at his depressing office for another normal day. Everything seems normal until the end of the day when the father begins to feel sick and begins to walk home. He tries to relax when he notices a blue wire sticking out of his index finger.

text: It is incorrect that everything seems normal

refinement: A family has breakfast together before going about their days. The father arrives at his depressing office for another normal day. Everything seems normal to the father until the end of the day when the father begins to feel sick and begins to walk home. He tries to relax when he notices a blue wire sticking out of his index finger.

text: 'The parents make small talk as they all eat a breakfast of bacon and eggs.', 'The children hurriedly scarf down the meal, eager for school. The mother picks up the dishes and together they walk out the door to begin the day.', 'he waves goodbye to his family and begins the trek to work.' is evidence that they a family has breakfast before going about their day.

text: 'is head feels like someone has hammered a nail into it.' is evidence that the father begins to feel sick.

answer:
The father from a traditional nuclear family experiences an episode that doesn't feel right. He leaves the office and begins his trek home. Already forgetful, he walks to his office unintentionally and sits by a tree. He notices an object in his hand when he falls asleep against the tree, disappearing the next day.

The disappearance of the object tells the man he's sick but that means nothing since it doesn't feel like he has a fever or any such ailments.

text: The father walks out of the office.

refinement:
The father from a traditional nuclear family experiences an episode that doesn't feel right. He leaves the office and begins his trek home. Already forgetful, he walks out of his office unintentionally and sits by a tree. He notices an object in his hand when he falls asleep against the tree, disappearing the next day.

The disappearance of the object tells the man he's sick but that means nothing since it doesn't feel like he has a fever or any such ailments.

text: The father does not walk out of the office unintentionally.

refinement: The father from a traditional nuclear family experiences an episode that doesn't feel right. He leaves the office and begins his trek home. Already forgetful, he walks out of his office and sits by a tree. He notices an object in his hand when he falls asleep against the tree, disappearing the next day. The disappearance of the object tells the man he's sick but that means nothing since it doesn't feel like he has a fever or any such ailments.

text: It is incorrect that the father falls asleep against the tree, disappearing the next day and that the disappearance of the object tells the man he's sick but that means nothing since it doesn't feel like he has a fever or any such ailments.

refinement: The father from a traditional nuclear family experiences an episode that doesn't feel right. He leaves the office and begins his trek home. Already forgetful, he walks out of his office and sits by a tree. He notices an object in his hand.

answer: The narrator brings up the idea of a happy, idyllic American family, living out a comfortable, normal life in an environment absolutely riddled with toxicity. Corpses laying around in the office and the streets, the sickly characters tromping through an old lot littered with glass are juxtaposed by this image. The main character's head feels like a nail is being hammered into it - he can't seem to see who is there with him and keep thinking someone should be present. He takes a blue wire protruding from his finger and smiles to himself.

text: It is not stated that corpses are laying around in the office.

refinement: The narrator brings up the idea of a happy, idyllic American family, living out a comfortable, normal life in an environment absolutely riddled with toxicity. Corpses laying around in the streets, the sickly characters tromping through an old lot littered with glass are juxtaposed by this image. The main character's head feels like a nail is being hammered into it - he can't seem to see who is there with him and keep thinking someone should be present. He takes a blue wire protruding from his finger and smiles to himself.

text: It is not stated that the father smiles himself.

refinement: The narrator brings up the idea of a happy, idyllic American family, living out a comfortable, normal life in an environment absolutely riddled with toxicity. Corpses laying around in the streets, the sickly characters tromping through an old lot littered with glass are juxtaposed by this image. The main character's head feels like a nail is being hammered into it - he can't seem to see who is there with him and keep thinking someone should be present. He takes a blue wire protruding from his finger.

answer: An idyllic, nuclear family breakfast is interrupted by a strange feeling in the father of the three children: he finds himself in a polluted wasteland, unable to recall this is all wrong. He cannot remember the world or the family he lives in, calling out to his roommate and work colleagues in the office, but no one responds. The splinter he pinpoints in his index finger is actually an exposed wire, and he begins to realize that this isn't the real world.

text: Breakfast is not interrupted.

refinement: An idyllic, nuclear family has breakfast. He cannot remember the world or the family he lives in, calling out to his roommate and work colleagues in the office, but no one responds. The splinter he pinpoints in his index finger is actually an exposed wire, and he begins to realize that this isn't the real world.

text: It is not stated the father cannot remember the world or the family he lives in.

refinement: An idyllic, nuclear family has breakfast. When the father arrives at the office, he is calling out to his roommate and work colleagues, but no one responds. The splinter he pinpoints in his index finger is actually an exposed wire, and he begins to realize that this isn't the real world.

text: It is not stated that he begins to realize that this isn't the real world.

refinement: An idyllic, nuclear family has breakfast. When the father arrives at the office, he is calling out to his roommate and work colleagues, but no one responds. The splinter he pinpoints in his index finger is actually an exposed wire.

text: The father's mental issues are omitted.

refinement: An idyllic, nuclear family has breakfast. When the father arrives at the office, he is calling out to his roommate and work colleagues, but no one responds. He has mental issues. The splinter he pinpoints in his index finger is actually an exposed wire.

answer:
The father comes in to work, and talks to everyone in the office. He jokes, trying to make them laugh but notices that no one responds, and forget's his car.

On the way home he feel's ill, and discovers a wire sticking out of his finger.

text: It is not stated that the father jokes, trying to make them laugh.

refinement: The father comes in to work, and talks to everyone in the office but notices that no one responds, and forget's his car. On the way home he feel's ill, and discovers a wire sticking out of his finger.

text: He starts feeling sick in the office.

refinement: The father comes in to work, and talks to everyone in the office but notices that no one responds, and forget's his car. He feel's ill, and discovers a wire sticking out of his finger.

text: Several typos.

refinement: The father comes into work, and talks to everyone in the office but notices that no one responds, and forgets his car. He feels ill and discovers a wire sticking out of his finger.

answer: A man, Jim, is in an office but feels like everyone has left. He leaves feeling like he needs to lie down. As he calmly sits near a tree, he notices a blue wire protruding from his finger. He tries to relax but then feels discomfort and confusion.

text: The father's name is not said.

refinement: A man is in an office but feels like everyone has left. He leaves feeling like he needs to lie down. As he calmly sits near a tree, he notices a blue wire protruding from his finger. He tries to relax but then feels discomfort and confusion.

text: It is not stated that he feels discomfort and confusion.

refinement: A man is in an office but feels like everyone has left. He leaves feeling like he needs to lie down. As he calmly sits near a tree, he notices a blue wire protruding from his finger. He tries to relax.

text: It is not stated that he calmly sits.

refinement: A man is in an office but feels like everyone has left. He leaves feeling like he needs to lie down. As he sits near a tree, he notices a blue wire protruding from his finger. He tries to relax.