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[The tympanum of the parish church of Cabestany, from which the Master derived his name, showing his characteristic style]

The MASTER OF CABESTANY is the name given to an anonymous sculptor active in the second half of the 12th century. He was identified in the 1930s after the discovery of several pieces remarkable for their workmanship and their style; chief among these was the tympanum of the church in Cabestany in the Pyrénées-Orientales department in southern France, from which he received his name. Subsequent research confirmed the presence of his works in the departments of Aude and Pyrénées-Orientales, as well as in northern Catalonia; examples of his art have also been seen in Tuscany and in Navarre.

Discovery

The sculptor's work was first encountered in the 1930s with the discovery of a Romanesque-style tympanum, found during restoration work at the parish church of Cabestany. The high technical quality of the carving, combined with the originality of the theme drew the interest of scholars of medieval art, who began to compare the sculpture with other known works. They concluded that the carver was an as-yet unknown figure, dubbed the “Master of Cabestany”, who was responsible for sculpting capitals, sarcophagi, and corbels that may still be seen in various religious structures.

In total, 121 sculptures have been attributed to the Master and to his studio. He has also been the subject of numerous studies, in subjects ranging from theology to history and art history. [Capital in the Abbey of Sant'Antimo in Tuscany]

Style

The Master's sculptures share a peculiar style unlike that of most Romanesque sculptors. All of his human figures have low, triangular faces; crushed chins; high, deeply carved ears; almond-shaped eyes with trepanning holes at either end; hands with long, tapering fingers; many folds in the drapery; and a great deal of detailed work identifying the principal figures.

Recent developments

At the start of the 1990s, the town of Cabestany decided to make as much of the sculptor's work as possible available. Also, in 1993, after consultation with the inspector general of historic monuments, the town created a scientific committee composed of eminent French and European figures to select which of the Master's sculptures they found the most important and most representative. With their advice the town initiated the creation of mouldings taken from various works. , over 60 castings had been realized by sculptor Alphonse Snoeck using a method agreed upon by the national director of historic monuments. The castings are made with cast stone which reproduces the same grain and color as may be seen in the originals, making them look identical to the original sculptures.

In 1994 the town acquired an old winemaking cave with over 1,100 metres of surface area; this has served as the home for a center devoted to Romanesque sculpture since June 2004. The center serves three purposes, acting as a museum, education center, and a center for research and study. The museum area shows the permanent collection of castings, complementing them with rooms describing local history, art history, and the history of Romanesque sculpture; the last room showcases examples of other carvers contemporaneous with the Master. The sculpture castings are displayed in various ways, either fixed to the wall or freestanding, and are grouped in thematic displays as well. The museum also explains the historic and artistic contexts of the Master and his work.

Work

[Sarcophagus of Saint Sernin at the Abbey of Saint-Hilaire] [Shaft from the church of San Giovanni In Sugana] The Master's sculptures may be seen in the following locations:

Pyrénées-Orientales (French Catalonia)

-   Cabestany - the tympanum of the parish church of Notre-Dame-des-Anges
-   Monastir del Camp - the capitals of the outer door are attributed to his studio
-   Le Boulou - the frieze on the outer door of the parish church of Sainte-Marie

Catalonia

-   Sant Pere de Rodes - some fragments of the now-destroyed door of the abbey church
-   Girona - some capitals in the abbey church of Sant Pere de Galligants
-   Barcelona - Museu Frederic Marès a relief that was taken away from Sant Pere de Rodes.

Navarre

-   Errondo - the tympanum from the church, which may today be found in The Cloisters of the Metropolitan Museum of Art

Aude

-   Rieux-Minervois - the capitals of the church of Saint-Marie; he was also the architect and chief artist of this church
-   Abbey of Saint-Hilaire - the reliquary of Saint Saturnin in the abbey church
-   Abbey of Saint-Papoul - the sculptures in the apse of the abbey church
-   Abbey of Sainte-Marie de Lagrasse - some fragments of the now-destroyed door of the abbey church; some believe these to be products of his studio

Tuscany

-   St. Antimo's Abbey - a capital in the nave of the abbey church depicting Daniel in the lions' den
-   San Giovanni in Sugana - a sculpted column held today at the museum of religious art of San Casciano Val di Pesa
-   Cathedral museum of Prato - the 12th-century zoomorphic capitals found in the cloister

Bibliography

-   COLLECTIF, _Le Maître de Cabestany_, Ed. Zodiaque, 2000.

title: Master of Cabestany

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Summarize the discovery of the Master of Cabestany.

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text: The text states that he was identified in the 1930s.

refinement: He was identified in the 1930s following the discovery of several pieces remarkable for their workmanship and style.

answer: The Master's work was first discovered in the 1930s with the discovery of a Romanesque-style tympanum found during restoration work at the parish church of Cabestany in southern France. His pieces, a total of 121 sculptures, were noted for their remarkable workmanship and style. Scholars concluded he was an unknown figure, so they dubbed him the "Master of Cabestany".

text: The line about his 121 sculptures isn't relevant to the topic.

refinement: The Master's work was first discovered in the 1930s with the discovery of a Romanesque-style tympanum found during restoration work at the parish church of Cabestany in southern France. Scholars concluded he was an unknown figure, so they dubbed him the "Master of Cabestany".

answer: The Master of Cabestany was an anonymous sculptor, identified in the 1930s after the discovery of a Romanesque-style tympanum at the parish church of Cabestany. The master was responsible for creating sculptures in various religious structures in different parts of France and Italy. Over 120 sculptures have been attributed to the Master and his studio.

text: The last two lines are irrelevant.

refinement: The Master of Cabestany was an anonymous sculptor, identified in the 1930s after the discovery of a Romanesque-style tympanum at the parish church of Cabestany.

answer: The Master of Cabestany was discovered in 1932 when the sculpture on the tympanum of the parish hall of Cabestany was discovered. It was named after the town in which it was found due to the theme of the piece (Christianity).

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refinement: The Master of Cabestany was discovered in 1932 when the sculpture on the tympanum of the parish hall of Cabestany was discovered. He was named after Cabestany, the location of the parish.

text: The specific year of 1932 is unattested.

refinement: The Master of Cabestany was discovered in the 1930s when the sculpture on the tympanum of the parish hall of Cabestany was discovered. He was named after Cabestany, the location of the parish.

answer: The anonymous sculptor referred to as the Master of Cabestany was first identified in the 1930s during restoration work at the parish church of Cabestany. He is responsible for a body of work that is notably characterized by a peculiar style of Romanesque sculptures, particularly with regards to facial features and gestures. 121 sculptures have been attributed to the Master and his studio.

text: The last two lines don't pertain to his discovery.

refinement: The anonymous sculptor referred to as the Master of Cabestany was first identified in the 1930s during restoration work at the parish church of Cabestany.

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Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize everything that happened in the 1990s.

answer: In the early 1990s, Cabestany decided to make the sculptor's work as available as possible. In 1993, the town created a scientific committee composed of eminent French and European figures to select which of the Master's sculptures they found to the most important and representative, which were then made into moldings. In 1994, Cabestany acquired a winemaking cave that is now devoted to Romanesque sculpture.

answer: In the 1990s, the town of Cabestany tried to make as many of the Master's sculptures as possible available. The town also commissioned sculptor Alphonse Snoeck to create a collection of castings made with cast stone, which are identical to the originals in grain and color. Finally, in 2004 the town created a center devoted to Romanesque sculpture. The center serves three purposes: it acts as a museum, an education center, and a center for research and study. There is a permanent collection of castings displayed in various ways and thematic displays. The primary focus of the center is the Master and his work.

text: What happened in 2004 is not relevant to the question.

refinement: In the 1990s, the town of Cabestany tried to make as many of the Master's sculptures as possible available. The town also commissioned sculptor Alphonse Snoeck to create a collection of castings made with cast stone, which are identical to the originals in grain and color.

text: The answer should mention the committee.

refinement: In the 1990s, the town of Cabestany tried to make as many of the Master's sculptures as possible available. The town also commissioned sculptor Alphonse Snoeck to create a collection of castings made with cast stone, which are identical to the originals in grain and color. In 1993, the town created a committee to select which of the Master's sculptures they found the most important.

text: The winemaking cave should be mentioned.

refinement: In the 1990s, the town of Cabestany tried to make as many of the Master's sculptures as possible available. The town also commissioned sculptor Alphonse Snoeck to create a collection of castings made with cast stone, which are identical to the originals in grain and color. In 1993, the town created a committee to select which of the Master's sculptures they found the most important. In 1994, the town acquired an old winemaking cave, which they later repurposed into a center devoted to Romanesque sculpture.

answer: During that time, the sculptor's work was first encountered. The sculptor's work sat the interest of scholars of medival art. The carver was subsequently identified and dubbed the "Master of Cabestany". His work was then made available throughout the town of Cabestany. A scientific committee of upstanding French and European figures was created to select which of the Master's sculptures they found the most important and most representative. The town subsequently issued sculptor Alphonse Snoeck to place the master's sculptures in mouldings. 60 castings were made and showcased in the Romanesque sculpture center.

text: Details not pertaining to the 1990s are included.

refinement: A scientific committee of upstanding French and European figures was created to select which of the Master's sculptures they found the most important and most representative. The town subsequently issued sculptor Alphonse Snoeck to place the master's sculptures in mouldings. 60 castings were made and showcased in the Romanesque sculpture center.

text: The overall effort in the 1990s should be mentioned.

refinement: In the 1990s, the town of Cabestany set out to make as much of the Master's work available as possible. A scientific committee of upstanding French and European figures was created to select which of the Master's sculptures they found the most important and most representative. The town subsequently issued sculptor Alphonse Snoeck to place the master's sculptures in mouldings. 60 castings were made and showcased in the Romanesque sculpture center.

answer: In the 1990s, the town of Cabestany took steps to make the Master's sculptures accessible, initiating the creation of castings. This process was continued in the creation of the Romanesque Sculpture Center in 2004, a museum that provides explanatory resources on the Master and medieval Romanesque sculpture more generally. The Center serves three purposes: as a museum, an education center, and a research center.

text: The events of the 2000s should not be summarized.

refinement: In the 1990s, the town of Cabestany took steps to make the Master's sculptures accessible, initiating the creation of castings.

text: The acommittee should also be mentioned.

refinement: In the 1990s, the town of Cabestany took steps to make the Master's sculptures accessible, initiating the creation of castings. A scientific committee was also formed to decide which of the Master's sculptures were the most important and representative.

answer: Cabestany decided to make as much of the sculptor's work as possible available, also a committee was created to help select which of the works to have cast. Then, in 1993, the town created a molding of a selection chosen by the committee. They also acquired a cave to use as a home for a center devoted to Romanesque sculpture.

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Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about where the Master's work has been located?

answer: The Master's sculptural work can be found in a number of locations. It is present in the Pyrénées-Orientales, Catalonia, Navarre, Aude and Tuscany.

text: Cabestany should also be mentioned.

refinement: The Master's sculptural work can be found in a number of locations. It is present in the Pyrénées-Orientales, Catalonia, Navarre, Aude and Tuscany. His work was first discovered in a parish church in Cabestany.

answer: Throughout Catalonia. Cabestany and Le Boulou being notable examples of the Master's work. He carved the capitals of Le Boulou's church, and in Cabestany, his masterful tympanum was discovered. There a number of Romanesque sculptures throughout Tuscany where the Master's work was also located.

answer: The Master's work has been found in the departments of Aude and Pyrénées-Orientales in southern France, in northern Catalonia, Tuscany, and in Navarre.

answer: His work has been found so far in Cabestany, Ariège, Catalonia, Catalonia, Navarre, Tuscany and Aude. He was responsible for sculpting capitals, sarcophagi, and corbels that may still be seen in various religious structures as well.

text: The second sentence is irrelevant.

refinement: His work has been found so far in Cabestany, Ariège, Catalonia, Catalonia, Navarre, Tuscany and Aude.

text: Catalonia is repeated.

refinement: His work has been found so far in Cabestany, Ariège, Catalonia, Navarre, Tuscany and Aude.

text: Ariège is not mentioned in the article.

refinement: His work has been found so far in Cabestany, Catalonia, Navarre, Tuscany and Aude.

answer: The Master's work was first found at a church in Cabestany in the Pyrénées-Orientales department in southern France. His work had also been found in Aude, Catalonia, Navarre, and Tuscany. His work was mostly found in churches in these areas. Some of his works can now be located in various museums.


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Tina Fey and Robert Carlock have recruited a recurring player from their comedy _30 Rock_ for their followup NBC series, 13-episode comedy _Tooken_. Tituss Burgess, who played D’Fwan, the flamboyant member of Tracy Jordan’s wife’s (Sherri Shepherd) entourage on _30 Rock_ for two seasons, is the first actor to join star Ellie Kemper in _Tooken._ Written by Fey and Carlock, who serve as showrunners_, Tooken_ centers on Kimmy (Kemper) who escapes from a doomsday cult and starts life over in New York. Burgess will play a gay, larger-than-life, [dfwan]genuinely talented singer who has never made it to Broadway and lives hand-to-mouth, working as a robot in Times Square. His relationship with Kimmy will re-energize him. The role appears tailor made and likely written for Burgess, down to the character name. Burgess is a talented singer who has appeared in a number of Broadway productions, including _Rent, The Little Mermaid_ and _Guys and Dolls_, and is openly gay. He’s repped by Hartig Hilepo Agency, Soffer-Namoff Entertainment and attorney Michael Mahan.

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answer: Tina Fey and Robert Carlock are the showrunners for the upcoming NBC series, "Tooken."

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answer: Tina Fey and Robert Carlock

text: "Written by Fey and Carlock, who serve as showrunners"

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text: "Written by Fey and Carlock, who serve as showrunners"

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text: "Written by Fey and Carlock, who serve as showrunners"

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text: The character who will be revitalized is Burgess's, not Kimmy.

refinement: Kimmy is described as a woman who has escaped from a doomsday cult and is starting life over in New York. The character is said to re-energize Tituss Burgess' character, who is described as a gay, larger-than-life, genuinely talented singer who has never made it to Broadway.

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refinement: Kimmy is described as a woman who has escaped from a doomsday cult and is starting life over in New York. The character is said to re-energize Tituss Burgess's character, who is described as a gay, larger-than-life, genuinely talented singer who has never made it to Broadway.

text: "Kimmy (Kemper) who escapes from a doomsday cult and starts life over in New York. Burgess will play a gay, larger-than-life, [dfwan]genuinely talented singer who has never made it to Broadway and lives hand-to-mouth, working as a robot in Times Square."

answer: Kimmy is described as a doomsday cult escapee who starts life over in New York.

text: "Kimmy (Kemper) who escapes from a doomsday cult and starts life over in New York."

answer: Kimmy's role is as someone who escapes from a doomsday cult and starts life over in New York

text: Kimmy is the role, not the actor.

refinement: Kimmy is described as someone who escapes from a doomsday cult and starts life over in New York

text: "Kimmy (Kemper) who escapes from a doomsday cult and starts life over in New York."

answer: Kimmy is a doomsday cult escapee who starts life over in New York.

text: "Kimmy (Kemper) who escapes from a doomsday cult and starts life over in New York."

question: Who is Burgess?

answer: He is a recurring player from 30 Rock.

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refinement: He is a recurring player from 30 Rock. He is a talented singer who appeared in several Broadway shows and is openly gay.

text: "Tituss Burgess, who played D’Fwan, the flamboyant member of Tracy Jordan’s wife’s (Sherri Shepherd) entourage on _30 Rock_"

answer: Tituss Burgess is an actor who will be appearing in the upcoming NBC comedy series "Tooken" alongside star Ellie Kemper.

text: The article has more information about Burgess than his appearance in Tooken. At least some of it should be in the answer.

refinement: Tituss Burgess is an actor who will be appearing in the upcoming NBC comedy series "Tooken" alongside star Ellie Kemper. He is a talented singer who appeared in several Broadway shows and is openly gay.

text: "Tituss Burgess, who played D’Fwan, the flamboyant member of Tracy Jordan’s wife’s (Sherri Shepherd) entourage on _30 Rock_ for two seasons, is the first actor to join star Ellie Kemper in _Tooken._"

answer: Burgess is a gay, larger-than-life, genuinely talented singer

text: Burgess's character in Tooken is described as larger-than-life, not Burgess himself.

refinement: Burgess is a gay and genuinely talented singer

text: Burgess's roles in Tooken and 30 Rock are the main points in the article.

refinement: Burgess is a gay and genuinely talented singer. He appeared in 30 Rock and will star in Tooken.

text: "Burgess is a talented singer who has appeared in a number of Broadway productions, including _Rent, The Little Mermaid_ and _Guys and Dolls_, and is openly gay."

answer: Tituss Burgess is a talented singer who has appeared in a number of Broadway productions, including _Rent, The Little Mermaid_ and _Guys and Dolls_, and is openly gay.

text: Burgess's roles in Tooken and 30 Rock are the main points in the article.

refinement: Tituss Burgess is a talented singer who has appeared in a number of Broadway productions, including _Rent, The Little Mermaid_ and _Guys and Dolls_, and is openly gay. He appeared in 30 Rock and will star in Tooken.

text: "Burgess is a talented singer who has appeared in a number of Broadway productions, including _Rent, The Little Mermaid_ and _Guys and Dolls_, and is openly gay."

question: What is the show being referred to called?

answer: The show referred to in the passage is called "Tooken."

text: "Tina Fey and Robert Carlock have recruited a recurring player from their comedy _30 Rock_ for their followup NBC series, 13-episode comedy _Tooken_."

answer: Tooken

text: Tina Fey and Robert Carlock have recruited a recurring player from their comedy _30 Rock_ for their followup NBC series, 13-episode comedy _Tooken_.

answer: Tooken.

text: Tina Fey and Robert Carlock have recruited a recurring player from their comedy _30 Rock_ for their followup NBC series, 13-episode comedy _Tooken_.

answer: 30 Rock

text: The main show being talked about in the article is "Tooken", not "30 Rock".

question: Write a ~1 sentence summary.

answer: This article describes the casting of Tituss Burgess in the NBC series, Tooken.

text: The answer should give more details about Burgess's role.

refinement: This article describes the casting of Tituss Burgess in the NBC series, Tooken, where he will play a larger-than-life, genuinely talented singer who never made it to Broadway.

text: "Tituss Burgess, who played D’Fwan, the flamboyant member of Tracy Jordan’s wife’s (Sherri Shepherd) entourage on _30 Rock_ for two seasons, is the first actor to join star Ellie Kemper in _Tooken._"

answer: Tina Fey and Robert Carlock have recruited Tituss Burgess, who played D'Fwan on 30 Rock, for their followup NBC series, 13-episode comedy Tooken.

text: Burgess's character in Tooken is more important than the character he used to play in 30 Rock.

refinement: Tina Fey and Robert Carlock have recruited Tituss Burgess for their NBC series, 13-episode comedy Tooken, where he will play as a larger-than-life, openly gay, and genuinely talented singer who never made it to Broadway.

text: "Tituss Burgess, who played D’Fwan, the flamboyant member of Tracy Jordan’s wife’s (Sherri Shepherd) entourage on _30 Rock_ for two seasons, is the first actor to join star Ellie Kemper in _Tooken._"

answer: Tituss Burgess, who played D'Fwan on 30 Rock, will star in Tina Fey and Robert Carlock's new comedy Tooken, about a woman who escapes from a doomsday cult and starts life over in New York.

text: Tituss Burgess's role in the upcoming movie is important enough to include in the answer.

refinement: Tituss Burgess, who played D'Fwan on 30 Rock, will star in Tina Fey and Robert Carlock's new comedy Tooken, about a woman who escapes from a doomsday cult and starts life over in New York, and he will play as a larger-than-life, genuinely talented, and openly gay singer who never made it to Broadway.

text: "Tituss Burgess, who played D’Fwan, the flamboyant member of Tracy Jordan’s wife’s (Sherri Shepherd) entourage on _30 Rock_ for two seasons, is the first actor to join star Ellie Kemper in _Tooken._ Written by Fey and Carlock, who serve as showrunners_, Tooken_ centers on Kimmy (Kemper) who escapes from a doomsday cult and starts life over in New York."

answer: Tina Fey and Robert Carlock's comedy, 30 Rock, is being described, along with the main characters and what they do in the show.

text: The article talks about Tina Fey and Robert Carlock's new show Tooken, not 30 Rock. The answer should be rewritten.

refinement: Tina Fey and Robert Carlock recruit their fellow actor from 30 Rock for their new comedy show Tooken centering on Kimmy who escaped from a doomsday cult and started her life again in New York, where Burgess will play as a genuinely talented gay singer who never made it to Broadway.


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	The Time I Found Love In A Senior Citizen –By Aaron Brooks

	Her Tinged Ciggerate’s heat radiated off into the back of my neck. I could feel her Presence. I couldn’t help but stare. Both me and my mother’s eyes were fixed on the slow burning Marlboro in her hand and the smoke that spit up her wrist.
“I’m A Libertarian, I don’t like to be told what to do.”
She observed my mom, down to the heartbeat. As did I. We both hated everything my mom did. We both hated being told what to do by my mothers all seeing eyes.
	She wasn’t the type of Libertarian who complains about Guantanamo Bay. She’s The Kind Of Libertarian who fucking drops Acid and goes to musical festivals. The epitimy of cool. Everything boring old me needed. Not only did she not have an opinion on Free trade economics SHE DIDN’T GIVE A FLYING FUCK ABOUT FREE TRADE ECONOMICS. She smoked weed on the hood of homeland security vehicals.
	The 14 in me wanted to end my conversation with her. Drugs, fun and freedom had taken there sweet toll on her body. Her hair was frizzed her clothes slightly tattered.  For being at the Jewish religious ceremony centered around death her shoeless feet dancing was quite the practice of someone celebrating life.  She was what a 65 year old women should be physically yet somehow she had redefined sexy for me in thirty seconds. We didn’t say much after that except small talk about “The fucking Bastard” known as Mayor Bloomberg. Everything she Said held so much weight. After our conversation came to a sad conclusion I mulled over her words like a priest reading the book of Mathew. I spent the rest of the night eating salled debating wether to go talk to her or not. I knew I would once have these debates with myself I didn’t know they’d would be about talking to someone who probably spent her morning opening social security checks. At a Shiva for all places! As if my pedophilic fantasies couldn’t get any worse, they had to be during a week that’s supposed to be filled with depression and tears.
	I looked all around the party for her, I curled around all the corners of the house. Elevating myself above tables scanning across the circles of people looking for her. Sometimes I saw her, but than she would be gone and disappear into another women. Some moments I would see her twice, at other times it seemed she never existed.
	Well fuck. She’s gone. I had my chance; I could have gone back to her house and talked into the morning. We could have drank, laughed and loved.
			KIDS THESE DAYS- Muriel Frumberg
	I had to get out of that shiva. My brother died for fucks sake, I can’t have one night of griping and smoking. This boy and his mother whom I had never met before came up to me wish me good luck or some shit. And they both stay fixated on the cigerates I was lighting back to back. People say they don’t care how you look, that’s bullshit. His mom looked so scared that I was talking to her son. Turns out this kid is some kind of Libertarian as well, he tried talking drones with me. Pathetic. I was minding my business my brother had just died. It was not the appropriate time for foreign policy discussion for fucks sake.
	You should have seen this kid. He was fucking weird. His eyes constantly were shifting around. He didn’t let people walk behind him. If you left the fucking boy alone for a second he would start mumbling to himself.
	I couldn’t help but feel bad for him. This kid’s definitely got something fucking wrong with him, probably have to do with something with his shitty bitch of a mother.
	THE NEXT IS A TEXT CONVERSATION AARON’S MOM AND DAD
DAVID: How was Shiva.
SARAH: It was good. Jean says “hi”.
Aaron was acting a little weird.
I think he was talking to voices again.
DAVID: What exactly was he doing
Or saying?
SARAH: He was talking about an old woman
He was talking to “her” about drones and
Mayor Bloomberg. He introduced me to her.
It was all very eerie.
DAVID: What else is there to do?
More therapy? More meds? What?
SARAH: Part of me says yes. However,
This is the first time I’ve seen Aaron
Happy in a long time.
DAVID: Are you suggesting we just
Let him live in his own little universe?
SARAH: Maybe just until the school
Year starts up again?
DAVID: Are you fucking insane? I think
We should send him back to the psych ward.
He’s obviously depressed.

title: I'm 14 with the beginning stages of schizophrenia. I feel free to answer any questions about Jewish terminalogy

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How real was the old lady the narrator was talking about?

answer: The old lady the narrator was talking to was likely not real. Considering the boy was talking to voices and hallucinating around the time of the Shiva it's likely that he mistook someone else as the old woman he was talking to. Additionally, his mother expressed reluctance in letting him continue talking to the old woman, suggesting she was rarely there or imagined. Therefore it is likely the old woman was not completely real.

text: The text has a text message exchange between Aaron's mother and father, where his mother implies the old lady was a hallucination.

refinement: The old lady the narrator was talking to was likely not real. Considering the boy was talking to voices and hallucinating around the time of the Shiva it's likely that he mistook someone else as the old woman he was talking to. Additionally, his mother mentions Aaron introducing her to a woman, calling it eerie.

text: The answer should mention the old lady's perspective.

refinement: The old lady the narrator was talking to was likely not real. Considering the boy was talking to voices and hallucinating around the time of the Shiva it's likely that he mistook someone else as the old woman he was talking to. Additionally, his mother mentions Aaron introducing her to a woman, calling it eerie. However, the story has a few paragraphs from the perspective of the old lady, strongly suggesting the woman was real.

answer: He definitely imagined her since she disappeared and reappeared multiple times. Even the thoughts like "what we sold, where the story of." It is more like an old man with an old woman.

text: The following part is completely meaningless: "Even the thoughts like "what we sold, where the story of." It is more like an old man with an old woman."

refinement: He definitely imagined her since she disappeared and reappeared multiple times.

text: The quoted evidence isn't enough to conclude the woman was imagined.

refinement: He could've imagined her since she disappeared and reappeared multiple times.

text: The answer should include the text messages between Aaron's mom and dad.

refinement: He could've imagined her since she disappeared and reappeared multiple times. The text messages between Aaron's mom and dad also imply the same thing.

text: The answer should mention the part of the story written from the perspective of the old lady.

refinement: He could've imagined her since she disappeared and reappeared multiple times. The text messages between Aaron's mom and dad also imply the same thing. However, there are three paragraphs written from the perspective of the old lady, suggesting she was real.

answer: It is unclear whether the old woman is real or imaginary to the narrator. Despite being an unknown figure to the narrator, he appears to have strong associations with her. The other characters in the passage seem to share some level of distrust for the woman as well. Overall, it seems likely that the old woman is partially imaginary and some type of projection of the narrator's needs or wants.

text: Instead of mentioning other characters' distrust, the answer should mention the texts between Aaron's mom and dad for clarity.

refinement: It is unclear whether the old woman is real or imaginary to the narrator. Despite being an unknown figure to the narrator, he appears to have strong associations with her. Aaron's mom and dad's texts also imply the woman is imagined. Overall, it seems likely that the old woman is partially imaginary and some type of projection of the narrator's needs or wants.

text: The evidence for the woman being real isn't mentioned. The story has a section written from the perspective of the old lady.

refinement: It is unclear whether the old woman is real or imaginary to the narrator. Despite being an unknown figure to the narrator, he appears to have strong associations with her. Aaron's mom and dad's texts also imply the woman is imagined. However, the story has a section written from the perspective of the old woman, suggesting she's real. Overall, it seems likely that the old woman is partially imaginary and some type of projection of the narrator's needs or wants.

text: There are two conflicting conclusions. The one saying it's unclear is the correct one.

refinement: It is unclear whether the old woman is real or imaginary to the narrator. Despite being an unknown figure to the narrator, he appears to have strong associations with her. Aaron's mom and dad's texts also imply the woman is imagined. However, the story has a section written from the perspective of the old woman, suggesting she's real.

answer:
The narrator (Aaron) has just seen a lady at a shiva. He believes she is the epitome of cool, unlike his mom and other women he is acquainted with.  Aaron badly wanted to converse with her. After a while, he approaches her and they started talking about politics. After their little chat, she leaves. Aaron misses her.

The lady, on the other hand, was a bit wary of Aaron's mannerisms. She thinks he is weird with his eyes movements and constant mumblings to himself. By all accounts, it seems Aaron's account of the lady and what the lady herself witnessed are different.

text: The answer is entirely irrelevant.

text: The answer is empty.

refinement: It is unclear whether the old woman is real or imaginary to the narrator. Despite being an unknown figure to the narrator, he appears to have strong associations with her. Aaron's mom and dad's texts also imply the woman is imagined. However, the story has a section written from the perspective of the old woman, suggesting she's real.

answer: It seems like she was a hallucination.

text: The answer should present all the related evidence.

refinement: It seems like she was a hallucination. Aaron's mom and dad's texts also imply the woman is imagined. However, the story has a section written from the perspective of the old woman, suggesting she's real.

text: The answer should state an overall conclusion, expressing the lack of clarity surrounding the reality of the old lady.

refinement: It seems like she was a hallucination. Aaron's mom and dad's texts also imply the woman is imagined. However, the story has a section written from the perspective of the old woman, suggesting she's real. Overall, it's unclear whether she was real or imagined.


text:
Hey readers (and writers) of Short Stories! This is my first post, and frankly, my first piece of writing (other than school) that I put a decent amount of time into. I'm just wondering what you guys think! Be honest, I want to improve. And yes, for the record, this is all true. EDIT: Sorry for my title being so similar to another post from a few hours earlier, I didn't even realize until after I posted!

The Midst of the Night

   As one slowly fades to two, my mind runs a marathon. As with a marathon, it is both painful and rewarding; remembering what was, imagining what could have been. A bittersweet river of emotions that I wish would end, but know will run on. Why must you do this to me?
The end is no fault of yours, really. Just fate. A cruel hand was dealt, and I had already pushed all my chips to the center. Did you? I long to know the answer, but also hope to never know. If you feel like I do, just show me a sign. Anything. But you won’t. Who’s to say you don’t have the same sleepless nights? You might. But my suspicion is you don’t. And knowing that for sure is a thousand times worse than not knowing.

   I try to recreate the past- mostly arguments. Why couldn’t they have ended better? Either way, they mean little that isn’t why it’s over. They are just a painful remainder of a mostly happy time. I was always the bad guy, you never did any wrong, yet I always just agreed. I was blinded by love. Now that the rose colored glasses are gone, I realize that isn’t true. My feelings are equal to those of everyone else.

   I create future conversations knowing all too well that they will never occur. Or if they do, not as well as in my head. I’m not as smooth a talker as I am a thinker, and while I know you well, you responses are unpredictable.

   The rational majority of my mind knows this needs to happen, and better now than later. Yet the small romantic area still aches. Each day I try to convince myself it’s fine. It’s an argument I have trouble winning. Must you convince yourself? Or had you long ago conquered that small voice of anti-reason lurking through your consciousness? That’s another thing it might be better not to know.

   Do you even care about me? Your words sound so, but your actions reek with apathy. If actions speak louder than words, your sentence of investment has been drowned out by the manifesto of disregard. I’m but an old newspaper: interesting at one time, now tossed in the corner, only to be glanced at occasionally. I pray that it is but a figment of my negative imagination.

   I know in time, all this will fade just as two now fades to three. It will be a black and white scene in a long film of technicolor. I only wish it could fade sooner. But time is a merciless warden, imprisoning you in the present, only allowing you to leave when he sees fit. The mind is a complex thing. It almost enjoys the pain. I am far simpler, and I don’t.

title: The Midst of the Night

question: Who is the narrator?

answer: The narrator appears to be someone who is struggling with a break-up. They appear to be reflecting on the past and imagining possible futures, but they seem to be resigned to the fact that the relationship is over.

text: Reflecting on the past: "I try to recreate the past- mostly arguments. Why couldn’t they have ended better? Either way, they mean little that isn’t why it’s over. They are just a painful remainder of a mostly happy time."

text: Imagined future: "I create future conversations knowing all too well that they will never occur."

text: Resignation: "I know in time, all this will fade just as two now fades to three. It will be a black and white scene in a long film of technicolor. I only wish it could fade sooner."

answer: There's not enough information to answer the question.

text: The answer is entirely wrong. The narrator can easily be described.

refinement: The narrator appears to be someone who is struggling with a break-up. They appear to be reflecting on the past and imagining possible futures, but they seem to be resigned to the fact that the relationship is over.

answer: That information can't be found

text: The answer is entirely wrong. The narrator can easily be described.

refinement: The narrator appears to be someone who is struggling with a break-up. They appear to be reflecting on the past and imagining possible futures, but they seem to be resigned to the fact that the relationship is over.

text: There's no answer. The narrator can easily be described.

refinement: The narrator appears to be someone who is struggling with a break-up. They appear to be reflecting on the past and imagining possible futures, but they seem to be resigned to the fact that the relationship is over.

question: What is the narrator thinking about?

answer: they are reflecting on their unfortunate circumstances, lost love, and their self-worth

text: The narrator isn't reflecting on his self-worth.

refinement: they are reflecting on their unfortunate circumstances and lost love.

text: The narrator reflects on past arguments with his lover more than his unfortunate circumstances.

refinement: they are reflecting on their past arguments with their significant other and lost love.

text: Lost love: "I try to recreate the past- mostly arguments. Why couldn’t they have ended better? Either way, they mean little that isn’t why it’s over. They are just a painful remainder of a mostly happy time."

answer: The narrator is thinking about the end of a relationship.

text: The answer is too vague. Hence it may mislead. It should clarify that the narrator is thinking about the past arguments with a significant other, and reflecting on the details.

refinement: The narrator is thinking about the past arguments with a significant other and reflecting on the details.

answer: The narrator is thinking about their relationship with their significant other, and how it ended. They are reflecting on the good times they had, as well as the bad times, and wondering why things didn't end better. They also think about what could have been, and what conversations they wish they could have had. They are also wondering if their significant other still cares about them, and if they are just being ignored.

text: Reflecting on the past: "I try to recreate the past- mostly arguments. Why couldn’t they have ended better? Either way, they mean little that isn’t why it’s over. They are just a painful remainder of a mostly happy time."

text: Imagined future: "I create future conversations knowing all too well that they will never occur."

text: Caring vs ignoring: "Do you even care about me? Your words sound so, but your actions reek with apathy. If actions speak louder than words, your sentence of investment has been drowned out by the manifesto of disregard."

text: There's no answer.

refinement: The narrator is thinking about their relationship with their significant other, and how it ended. They are reflecting on the good times they had, as well as the bad times, and wondering why things didn't end better. They also think about what could have been, and what conversations they wish they could have had. They are also wondering if their significant other still cares about them, and if they are just being ignored.

question: Who is the narrator talking to?

text: There's no answer.

refinement: The narrator isn't talking to anyone. They are thinking.

answer: The narrator is talking to someone who they believe is experiencing the same feelings as them, but they are unsure if the other person is actually aware of their feelings.

text: The narrator isn't talking to anyone. They are thinking.

refinement: The narrator isn't talking to anyone. They are thinking.

answer: There's not enough information to answer the question.

text: The entire story is the narrator's thinking.

refinement: The narrator isn't talking to anyone. They are thinking.

answer: The narrator is talking to their ex-partner.

text: The narrator isn't talking to anyone. They are thinking.

refinement: The narrator isn't talking to anyone. They are thinking.

question: What does the narrator think will fade?

answer: The narrator thinks that the pain of the breakup will eventually fade away.

answer: The narrator thinks that the pain will fade.

answer: Their anger and frustrations

text: The narrator thinks the pain will fade. He doesn't express any anger or frustruation.

text: There's no answer.

refinement: The narrator thinks that the pain will fade.

question: Write a ~3 sentence summary.

answer: The narrator is angry and can't sleep, so they have a long rant in their mind directed at some person that's offended them. They reflect on their negative feelings about their situation. As they count, trying to sleep, they think about how to the anger will eventually fade.

text: The answer frames the story in an entirely wrong way. It should be rewritten.

refinement: The narrator is melancholic and can't sleep, so they have a long night in their mind thinking about their ex. They reflect on their past conversations and arguments as well as potential future dialogues that won't happen. As they try to sleep, they think about how the pain will eventually fade.

answer: The narrator is in a relationship with someone who is apathetic towards them. They are trying to convince themselves that it's fine, but they are having a hard time convincing themselves. They are trying to recreate the past and imagine future conversations, but they know that they will never occur.

text: The relationship is over, and that's why the narrator is thinking these thoughts.

refinement: The narrator has broken up with someone who was apathetic towards them. They are trying to convince themselves that it's fine, but they are having a hard time convincing themselves. They are trying to recreate the past and imagine future conversations, but they know that they will never occur.

text: The narrator isn't trying to convince himself. They are just reflecting.

refinement: The narrator has broken up with someone who was apathetic towards them. They are trying to recreate the past and imagine future conversations, but they know that they will never occur.

text: The narrator eventually concludes that the pain will fade.

refinement: The narrator has broken up with someone who was apathetic towards them. They are trying to recreate the past and imagine future conversations, but they know that they will never occur. The narrator knows that the pain will end eventually.

answer: The author is reflecting on a past relationship and the emotions that come with it.

text: The answer is too vague despite the fact that it can have two more sentences. It should include the most important parts of the story.

refinement: The author is reflecting on a past relationship and the emotions that come with it. They imagine past and future arguments, knowing nothing will change. They eventually come to peace with the break up and admit that the pain will fade.

answer: The narrator is struggling with the end of a relationship, and spends their sleepless nights remembering happier times and imagining conversations that will never happen. They know that eventually the pain will fade, but wish it would happen sooner.

text: Happy past: "I try to recreate the past- mostly arguments. Why couldn’t they have ended better? Either way, they mean little that isn’t why it’s over. They are just a painful remainder of a mostly happy time."

text: The future that won't happen: "I create future conversations knowing all too well that they will never occur."

text: Pain will fade: "I know in time, all this will fade just as two now fades to three. It will be a black and white scene in a long film of technicolor. I only wish it could fade sooner."


text:
"Handlebars" is a song by Flobots. It was released as the first single from their debut album, Fight with Tools, and is the group's largest success, peaking at number three on the Billboard Modern Rock Tracks chart.
 Background
"Handlebars" was originally released in 2005 on the band's first EP, Flobots Present...Platypus, before being re-released on Fight with Tools two years later. The song won in a fan-voted local radio station contest at the end of 2007, giving the song the chance to be played on the station.  The song was so popular that it was put into full rotation at the station by the end of January, attracting the attention of record companies. The Flobots ultimately signed with Universal Republic off the back of the single's success.
 Theme
Jamie Laurie stated that the song is about "the idea that we have so much incredible potential as human beings to be destructive or to be creative." "And it's tragic to me that the appetite for military innovation is endless, but when it comes to taking on a project like ending world hunger, it's seen as outlandish. It's not treated with the same seriousness. ... at the same time, I knew there were people at that moment who were being bombed by our own country. And I thought that was incredibly powerful." It is the contrast between these "little moments of creativity, these bursts of innovation," and the way these ideas are put to use "to oppress and destroy people" that the singer feels is "beautiful and tragic at the same time."
In May 2019, Flobots sued YouTube user Logan Paul for copyright infringement over his 2017 single "No Handlebars". The group has requested all royalties for the song, which has earned Paul over $1 million since 2017.
 Music video
The video for the song is animated. It starts out lighthearted, showing two young friends sitting on a hill looking over a city. Prominent in the city is a crystalline tower with part of its framework showing. The friends ride their bikes down the hill without their hands on the handlebars, while one smiles widely. They arrive at a sign that points in two directions, one labeled with a corporate-looking symbol leading to a shadowed street, and the other labeled by a dove leading down a sunlit street. They hug and head their separate ways, the one who originally smiled taking the path of the dove.
The next part of the song centers on the friend who went the way of the dove. He walks along a cracked sidewalk and sees a chalk drawing depicting the first scene of the video: two children on bicycles with their arms in the air, riding down a hill next to a city. He picks up an apple off of the ground and puts it back in its barrel. He walks past a street corner that shows a path to the corporate street. He does not see that there is blood on the walls of the corporate street. He picks up his phone and sees the corporate friend's face. Here the perspective switches to the other friend, and he speaks to the peaceful friend on the phone.
The corporate friend hangs up and walks down the street. He lists his accomplishments and they are shown in the video before he stops in front of the same tower that appeared in the beginning of the video and looks up at it. In the next scene he is completing a transaction with a man in a board room. A graph displays profits zigzagging up a board with the corporate logo on it before ending in what looks like a spatter of blood. The camera zooms out and reveals that he was inside the tower. He then gives a speech behind a podium which is broadcast on television. The background changes from the original corporate image into two American flags. The other friend sees it and shakes his head in disappointment.
The scene then cuts to the world being more bleak and oppressive, with security cameras and smokestacks, emblazoned with the corporate logo, spewing toxic fumes into the air. A scene features the dove being killed by a hawk, and a fighter jet soars overhead.
In the next sequence, the previously peaceful friend begins rallying a crowd of oppressed-looking people. A man wearing a bandana sprays an X over a poster with a picture of the now-dictator-like friend on it, and then the word "LIAR" below that. A crowd of people, led by the rebellious friend, advance on the tower. They are stopped by a line of heavily armed riot-control officers, with shields displaying a fist and submachine guns, who proceed to kill the entire crowd. The bandana wearing man is killed first by a sniper, following many more deaths. The corporate friend looks on in horror as he sees his friend shot down dead and lying on the ground.
The video ends with a flashback of the two friends pedaling off riding with no handlebars crisscrossing into a bright light.
Several times in the video, the dove used as a symbol is destroyed. Once an actual dove is killed by a hawk. The second time a wall with a dove painted on it, located next to a billboard displaying the corporate symbol and a cityscape again featuring the tower, is destroyed by a wrecking ball. In addition, a hawk flies over the head of the corporate friend when he is walking down the street.
A reference made within the video is to Che Guevara, an iconic revolutionist. An image of Guevara's face appears on a man's T-shirt when the oppressed friend is rallying a crowd. Another reference is to the Abu Ghraib tortures during the Iraq War, seen in a flashing image identical to the iconic photograph of prisoner Abdou Hussain Saad Faleh.
 Chart performance
On May 17, 2008, the song peaked at number 3 on the Billboard Modern Rock Tracks. Fueled by radio airplay, including six straight weeks at the top of KROQ's most played list, it was the first single since Semisonic's "Closing Time" to chart in the top ten so quickly.
It has had similar success on the digital landscape, having over 16,500,000 total plays on the band's MySpace.com page and over a substantial 54 million views on YouTube. Digital download purchases have placed the song at number 4 on certain rap and hip-hop charts on Amazon.com.
"Handlebars" also performed well on the Billboard charts. Peaking at number three on the Modern Rock Tracks chart, number twenty-two on the Hot Digital Songs chart, number thirty-five on the Pop 100 chart, number thirty-seven on the Hot 100 chart, number sixty-three on the Canadian Hot 100.
On September 7, 2008, the song entered the UK Singles Chart at number 35 on downloads alone and peaked at 14.
 Track listing
Compact Disc
#"Handlebars" – 3:27
#"Rise" – 4:10
7-inch vinyl
#"Handlebars" – 3:27
#"Handlebars" (DJ Shadow Remix) – 4:03
 Personnel
Flobots
*Jamie "Jonny 5" Laurie –  vocals
*Brer Rabbit – vocals
*Jesse Walker – electric bass
*Andy "Rok" Guerrero – guitar
*Mackenzie Roberts – viola
*Kenny Ortiz – drums
Guest musicians
*Joe Ferrone – trumpet
 Charts
 Weekly charts
 Year-end charts

title: Handlebars (song)

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How popular was the song "Handlebars"?

answer: It peaked at number three on Billboard Modern Rock Tracks chart, had 16 million plays on MySpace and 54 million views on YouTube, and entered the UK Singles Chart at 35 and peaked at 14. The song attracted the attention of record companies that "signed" with Universal Records to the surprise of some fans. It was the first single since Semisonic's "Closing Time" to chart in the top ten so quickly.

text: The response inaccurately mentions that the signing was a surprise to some fans. This detail is not evidenced in the passage.

refinement: It peaked at number three on Billboard Modern Rock Tracks chart, had 16 million plays on MySpace and 54 million views on YouTube, and entered the UK Singles Chart at 35 and peaked at 14. The song attracted the attention of record companies that "signed" with Universal Records. It was the first single since Semisonic's "Closing Time" to chart in the top ten so quickly.

text: grammar error in the response.

refinement: It peaked at number three on Billboard Modern Rock Tracks chart, had 16 million plays on MySpace and 54 million views on YouTube, and entered the UK Singles Chart at 35 and peaked at 14. The song attracted the attention of record companies and ultimately signed with Universal Republic. It was the first single since Semisonic's "Closing Time" to chart in the top ten so quickly.

answer: It fared well on the Billboard charts.

text: The response misses to mention that the song was so popular, the band got signed to Universal Republic. It was also put on regular rotation on a radio station.

refinement: It fared well on the Billboard charts. The song was so popular that a radio station put it on its full rotation. Its success led to getting the band signed by Universal Republic.

answer: The song, "Handlebars", was very popular when it released. It was so popular that when it was put into full rotation at the station by the end of January, and attracted many record companies. Flobots, the band who produced the song, signed off to Universal Republic due to the song's success.

text: grammar error in the response.

refinement: The song, "Handlebars", was very popular when it released. It was so popular that when it was put into full rotation at the station by the end of January, it attracted many record companies. Flobots, the band who produced the song, signed off to Universal Republic due to the song's success.

answer: The song was extremely popular, becoming the first single since Semisonic's "Closing Time" to chart in the top ten quickly. "Handlebars" peaked at number three on the Billboard Modern Rock Tracks and had over 54 million views on YouTube. Digital download purchases have also placed the song in several charts on various sites.

text: The response misses to mention that due to the song's success, the band was signed by Universal Republic.

refinement: The song was extremely popular, becoming the first single since Semisonic's "Closing Time" to chart in the top ten quickly. "Handlebars" peaked at number three on the Billboard Modern Rock Tracks and had over 54 million views on YouTube. Digital download purchases have also placed the song in several charts on various sites. The song became so successful, that the band was signed by Universal Republic.

answer: "Handlebars" was a moderately successful song, peaking at number 3 on the Billboard Modern Rock Tracks chart and charting in the top ten in several charts. It has been streamed over 16 million times and had 54 million views on YouTube.

text: The response inaccurately mention the song was only moderately successful.

refinement: "Handlebars" was a successful song, peaking at number 3 on the Billboard Modern Rock Tracks chart and charting in the top ten in several charts. It has been streamed over 16 million times and had 54 million views on YouTube.

text: The response misses to mention that the song was so successful, the band was signed by Universal Republic.

refinement: "Handlebars" was a successful song, peaking at number 3 on the Billboard Modern Rock Tracks chart and charting in the top ten in several charts. It has been streamed over 16 million times and had 54 million views on YouTube. The song became so successful, the band was signed by Universal Republic.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Describe the setting for the video for the song, "Handlebars".

answer: The video starts out by depicting children riding their bikes over a hill. Two boys ride to the top of a hill overlooking a city. Prominently displayed in that city is a twisted, crystalline tower with part of its framework showing. The boys wink at each other and head their separate ways. As the song progresses, the focus shifts to their contrasting futures. One boy, who is the 'establishment' one, is successful, at least on paper. The other, the wingman from the song, is fighting an insurgency.

text: The timeline of events is out of order

refinement: The video starts out by depicting children on a hill overlooking a city. The friends ride their bikes down the hill. Prominently displayed in that city is a twisted, crystalline tower with part of its framework showing. The boys wink at each other and head their separate ways. As the song progresses, the focus shifts to their contrasting futures. One boy, who is the 'establishment' one, is successful, at least on paper. The other, the wingman from the song, is fighting an insurgency.

answer: The video starts out lightheartedly, showing two young friends sitting on a hill looking over a city. Prominent in the city is a crystalline tower with part of its framework showing. The friends fly their bikes down the hill without their hands on the handlebars while one smiles widely. They arrive at a sign that points in two directions, one labelled by a dove leading down a sunlit street and the other labeled by a corporate-looking symbol leading to a shadowed street. They hug and head their separate ways. The setting progresses to show a devastating world and a corporate headquarters.

answer: The video for this song was animated and started out with two young friends sitting on a hill, looking over a city. The friends ride their bikes down a hill without their hands on handlebars. The video is very intricate and has many different scenes, but the video ends with two friends pedaling off riding with no handlebars, and the symbolism of the song is portrayed beautifully in the video.

text: The response misses to mention that the video portrays an oppressed society massacred by the corporate friend, while the peaceful friend rallies a crowd against the tyranny.

refinement: The video for this song was animated and started out with two young friends sitting on a hill, looking over a city. The friends ride their bikes down a hill without their hands on handlebars. The video portrays an oppressed society massacred by the corporate friend's tyranny. Meanwhile, the peaceful friend attempts to rally a crowd against them. The video ends with two friends pedaling off riding with no handlebars, and the symbolism of the song is portrayed beautifully in the video.

answer: The video for "Handlebars" is animated in a somewhat lighthearted setting. It centers on two young friends, one who goes down a bright, sunlit path and the other who stays behind and watches as his friend's path becomes more bleak and oppressive. The friends communicate through phone calls and ultimately the friend on the bright path rallies an oppressed crowd and are subsequently massacred by armed riot-control officers. The animation ends with a flashback of the two friends riding together without the use of handlebars. The setting is primarily urban, with scenes depicting a cityscape, cracks on sidewalks and streets, and the inside of a corporate tower.

answer: The video for the song is animated and takes place in a city. The first scene shows two friends riding their bicycles down a hill and approaching a sign that points in two directions. The peaceful friend takes the path marked with a dove while the corporate friend heads down a shadowed street. As the song progresses, the world becomes more oppressive, and the peaceful friend leads a revolt against the corporate friend's dictatorial tyranny. The final scene shows the peaceful friend shot down by a sniper and killed.


text:
Arches. Whorls. Creases. A Maze of Lines. Loops. Forks. Pathways.

Living in the suburbs of L.A., she has turned into a clone of the latest thing. She lives where superficial is the inner soul. Where trying to be someone else is the norm. Where uniqueness can only safely be expressed in a fashion statement. Where her fiery red hair is a flaw that needs to be changed and forgotten.

Trying to be someone else’s ideal is a tiring life long act. She begs the world to let her off of the stage. She begins to cry in her hands and notices that there is something that sets her apart in her little corner of the world. They can not be copied or altered. She can leave her unique stamp, imprint, and mark wherever she goes. Her fingerprints tell her, no matter how hard she tries, that she can never truly be anything else but herself.

title: A Maze of Lines

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who is she?

answer: The protagonist is a young woman living in suburban Los Angeles. She has realized that her red hair is her unique identifier and embodies her individuality. She has decided to live authentically and express her uniqueness in whatever way she can.

text: She is not trying to be unique

refinement: The protagonist is a young woman living in suburban Los Angeles.

answer: She is someone who lives in L.A.

answer: The text does not say.

text: A woman living in the suburbs of L.A.

answer: A woman living in the suburbs of L.A.

answer: The main character is an unsatisfied suburban teenager stuck in an image that doesn't fit her. She feels pressured to change her natural features and identity and wants to be more unique in her community.

text: A woman living in the suburbs of L.A.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Whose ideal is she trying to be?

answer: The ideal of "the latest thing."

answer: It can be assumed the she means the ideal of someone else, not herself.

answer: That information is not known.

text: The protagonist is trying to be someone else's ideal.

refinement: The protagonist is trying to be someone else's ideal.

answer: She is trying to be someone else's ideal.

answer: The protagonist is trying to be someone else's ideal.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why has she begun to cry?

answer: She is crying because she feels alone and tired of trying to fit in with what others want her to be. She doesn't want to be something she's not; she wants to be unique. Her fingerprints prove this to be true no matter how much she tries to be someone else. Therefore, she's crying because she feels all alone and misunderstood.

text: It's the opposite

refinement: It seems she's self-aware that she can't be an ideal to anyone else because she's unique and her hair color tells others she is unique and she wishes she was not.

answer: It seems she's self-aware that she can't be an ideal to anyone else because she's unique and her hair color tells others she is unique and she wishes she was not.

answer: It may be implied that she begins crying for the fact she thinks that nothing is unique about her. She thinks that she is a clone of the latest thing.

text: It's the opposite

refinement: It seems she's self-aware that she can't be an ideal to anyone else because she's unique and her hair color tells others she is unique and she wishes she was not.

answer: Because the constant fashion changes are tiring and she wants to be herself.

text: It's the opposite

refinement: It seems she's self-aware that she can't be an ideal to anyone else because she's unique and her hair color tells others she is unique and she wishes she was not.

answer: She has begun to cry because she realizes that no matter how hard she tries, she can never be something she is not- being herself is her unique identifier in a world where being superficial is seemingly the only way to survive.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Is her hair actually red?

answer: It is implied that it is.

answer: The text doesn't explicitly say, but the fact that her hair color is considered a flaw points to the fact that it's red.

answer: Yes. Her hair is indeed red.

answer: Yes.

answer: Yes, her hair is red.

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: This story is about a woman in the suburbs of Los Angeles who feels as if she living in a clone city; as if trying to be someone else and living life superficially is a norm there. She feels she has something special about her that sets her apart from what the city offers her.

answer: The speaker spends time examining the maze of lines that make up her unique character. She concludes that she will never be like anyone else, and that this uniqueness is one of her strengths.

answer: A woman she lives in suburbia and tries to fit in with the current trends. She feels like she can't escape, but sees her fingerprints as a unique identifier that she can't change.

answer: This reflection paints a picture of the challenges of living in an overly artificial culture, and finding a unique self despite the pressure to fit in. Ultimately, the narrator realized that she alone holds the keys to being herself, despite the pressures of society.

answer: Living in L.A., the main character tries to transform herself into the latest trends. But this is tiring, and she knows deep down that she can never be truly anything but herself.


text:
As my eyes open, blinded by the light coming from the window, I drag myself from the cozy warmth of my bed and stagger to the bathroom. When I get to the bathroom I splash some water on my face and look at myself in the mirror. I look like I have been dragged through hell and back. As I’m looking in the mirror, I notice a shadow from behind the shower curtain.
“Jason? Is that you?”

No reply.

I approach the curtain and throw it aside. Standing in the shower is my roommate, his eyes bloodshot and swollen and teeth blackened from years of smoking and poor hygiene. Then I smelt and saw something terrible. His body had begun to rot away from his bones. My eyes widened as I realized what had happened. He had been infected.

It was at that moment that I knew I was in trouble.

I flee from the bathroom in a terrified frenzy, slamming the door behind me, and run to my room where I frantically get dressed and grab the survival kit I keep in the wardrobe. Hearing the noises coming from the bathroom, I leave the house and walk out onto the empty street. With nothing but my backpack filled with food and ammunition, my trusty sawn-off shotgun and my ever faithful baseball bat, I start walking away from my house, hearing it burn behind me.

After hours of walking, I finally get to the Pine Hills shopping Centre, as I enter the centre, I can feel the eyes of hundreds of people staring at me. My heart begins to pound and I can feel my adrenalin rising as I see that everyone is rotting away before my eyes. I panic and pull out my shotgun and begin to let loose. With each shot fired, I see mangled bodies drop to the floor, but each dead body that falls is replaced by multiple living ones. As the infected start surrounding me, I decide that it is time that I got out of here, so without thinking I run down the corridor, only to find that the infected are coming at me from both directions.  I draw my baseball bat from my back pack and make a mad dash for the exit, bodies crumpling in my wake. I finally make it outside, but I don’t stop running, I can’t stop, I have to get away from here.

After what feels like hours, I have to stop running and rest. Taking the last sip from my water bottle, I notice that it’s starting to get dark and that I need to sleep. After walking for about an hour, I find a house that looks deserted and decide to seek refuge in its walls. Warily I enter the house and walk to the nearest room, to my surprise there is a king sized bed with clean covers and a small fridge next to it. Looking in the fridge I find an unlabeled bottle of liquid, I open it and am instantly hit with a wave of sensory delights.  I smile to myself and take a swig of the bottles contents, its warmth travelling through my body and making my fingertips tingle. After emptying the bottle down my throat, I fall asleep.

Woken by the blinding light, I think I am home in my own bed, only to find that three large men in white uniforms are shining torches in my eyes. Ignoring my efforts to escape, they drag me almost effortlessly to their van and throw me into the back, my head hitting the steel seat inside and knocking me unconscious.

Once again by bright lights, I find myself strapped to a cold steel table in a white room. I can just hear the men in white talking from outside the door.
“According to his driver’s license, this guy’s name is Mitchell Cameron, He’s a Iraq veteran from Pine Hills, that little town a few miles away..” said the first man in white.
“I thought he looked familiar!” exclaimed the second man, “he was in the news a few months ago, apparently he had some sort of mental breakdown and set fire to his girlfriend’s dog.”
Hearing this sends me into a panic. I can feel the straps loosening as I struggle against them. After hours of struggling, I am free. I leave the white room, only to find myself in a white corridor, feeling extremely disoriented, I stumble down the corridor just to find myself at a dead end. I turn and see the three men in white at the other end of the corridor, one holding a large syringe and the others holding stun guns. I run at them. They yell “Sir you are having a mental breakdown! Please stop so we can help you!” but I know better, I can tell they are lying. As I get closer I see their rotting bodies and prepare myself for a fight. Unarmed, I am defenseless and outnumbered. The men pin me to the ground with ease and inject me with the purple liquid in the syringe. The room starts to spin and go black.
After what feels like years of sleep, I finally wake up, Strapped to the table once again. I can hear voices from the corridor. “Mitchell Cameron was found in a young couple’s house last night and has been charged with the murders of 83 men, women and children in yesterday’s Pine Mall Massacre.  He is suffering from Post-Traumatic Stress and will remain here in the Northwood mental asylum until further notice.”
Not believing the lies of the infected scum, I free myself from my restraints, but instead of attempting to run down the corridor again, I have no other option but to find a different means of escape. I tip the table on its side and tie one of the restraints onto its leg. I then slip the loop around my neck and take my final breath.

title: Perspectives (998 words)

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Who is the narrator?

answer: That information can't be found

text: The answer is in the text and the narrator is Mitchell Cameron.

answer: The narrator is Mitchell Cameron.

answer: The narrator is Mitchell Cameron, an Iraq veteran.

answer: The narrator is Mitchell Cameron.

answer: He's called the protagonist. He broke into a house to sleep in the white room and wandered incapacitated to the Northwood mental asylum.

text: it fails to mention that the narrator is Mitchell Cameron

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What has happened to the narrator's roommate?

answer: The narrator's roommate has been infected with a virus and started to rot away from his bones. This leaves the narrator in danger of being infected. The narrator flees and eventually retreats into a deserted house, where he is captured by a group of people in white uniforms and injected with a syringe.

text: Extra details distracts from the question.

refinement: The narrator's roommate has been infected with a virus and started to rot away from his bones.

answer: It may be implied that the roommate's body got infected because of Mitchell.

text: There's no evidence to suggest that the roommate's body was infected. However it might have been Mitchell's actions that killed the roommate.

refinement: It may be implied that the roommate was killed by Mitchell.

answer: He has been infected and now his body has begun to rot away.

answer: He's dying or dead behind the shower curtain

answer: The narrator's roommate has become infected by the zombie virus and died. The narrator fled their house and later managed to find refuge in a house, only to have to fight off a group of armed infected at the shopping centre. The narrator has been captured by men in white and is being held in a mental asylum.

text: Extra irrelevant details distracts from the question.

refinement: The narrator's roommate has become infected by the zombie virus and died.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Why did the narrator shoot the people at the shopping centre?

answer: The narrator had to shoot them out of self defence.

answer: The narrator could see that people near him were getting infected and hence let loose of his gun.

answer: There wasn't a better option. Probably also the shock of finding out about the zombie-like infection that's killing people would provoke a strong response.

answer: The narrator shot the people at the shopping center in self-defense due to being surrounded by an overwhelming number of infected individuals. The infected were rotting away and posed a real risk. The narrator had already seen the effects of the infection firsthand in his roommate and knew that escape was the only option.

answer: The protagonist shot the people at the shopping center because they were infected and he felt he had no other option. He believed himself to be in danger and felt he had to fight to survive.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Is the narrator mentally ill?

answer: Yes, it is assumed that he is suffering from Post-Traumatic Stress.

text: "He is suffering from Post-Traumatic Stress and will remain here in the Northwood mental asylum until further notice" is evidence that the narrator is mentally unstable.

answer: No, the narrator is not mentally ill.

text: It incorrectly mentions that the narrator is not ill, however it is implied that the narrator is suffering from PTSD

refinement: Yes, the narrator is suffering from PTSD

answer: This information can't be found.

text: it is implied that the narrator is suffering from PTSD

refinement: It is implied that the narrator is suffering from PTSD.

answer: Yes, the narrator appears to be mentally ill. The events described indicate that the narrator is prone to delusions and hallucinations, and is prone to panic when under pressure. He is clearly disturbed by witnessing the rampant infection. The inability to distinguish between reasonable and unreasonable threats indicates a potential mental illness.

text: "He is suffering from Post-Traumatic Stress and will remain here in the Northwood mental asylum until further notice" is evidence that the narrator is mentally unstable.

answer: The twist of this story is that Mitchell Cameron actually is the one who became mentally ill, resulting in his escape to the Pine Hills shopping center, where he killed people. The group that apprehended him and brought him back to the mental asylum are the mentally ill ones, as they injected him, strapping him to a table, falsely accusing him of murdering many innocent people.

text: There's no evidence to suggest that the accusations are false.

refinement: Yes, the narrator seems to be mentally unstable and suffering from PTSD.

question: Write a ~7 sentence summary.

answer: Mitchell wakes up to find his roommate turned into a zombie, and narrowly escapes. He arrives at a shopping mall, where he is captured by three men in white and injected with a virus. Once finally awake again, Mitchell finds himself strapped to a table in a mental asylum for 83 murders. With no other options, he sets up a trap and commits suicide.

text: It misses mentioning that at the shopping mall, the narrator begins to fire away at all the zombies.

refinement: Mitchell wakes up to find his roommate turned into a zombie, and narrowly escapes. He arrives at a shopping mall, where he begins to fire away at all the zombies. He is awoken in a deserted house by three men in white uniforms who take him to a mental asylum. Once finally awake again, Mitchell finds himself strapped to a table in the asylum and charged for 83 murders at the shopping mall. With no other options, he sets up a trap and commits suicide.

text: Misses mentioning his failed escape attempt and the narrator's theory that the men in the asylum were lying.

refinement: Mitchell wakes up to find his roommate turned into a zombie, and narrowly escapes. He arrives at a shopping mall, where he begins to fire away at all the zombies. He is awoken in a deserted house by three men in white uniforms who take him to a mental asylum. Once finally awake again, Mitchell finds himself strapped to a table in the asylum and charged for 83 murders at the shopping mall. He attempts to escape but has no success and he's subdued once again. Thinking that the men in the asylum were lying and infected, he tries a different escape. With no other options, he sets up a trap and commits suicide.

answer: The story starts with the narrator waking from a night of sleep. After taking a look at the mirror, they realize they have become one of the infected. They take their survival kit and a shotgun and flee their home where they hear the bedroom door creak. They make their way to the Pine Hills Shopping Center, fighting off the infected all the way. They stop at a house by the roadside to rest and realize they are surrounded by armed men in uniform. They are taken to a room (possibly an ambulance) and forcibly injected. When they wake up and look around, they learn that they have committed a massacre at Pine Hill shopping mall and now being held for their crimes.

text: There is no evidence to suggest that the narrator thought he was infected.

refinement: The story starts with the narrator waking from a night of sleep. After taking a look at the mirror, they realize they were in trouble as his roommate had been infected and rotting away. They take their survival kit and a shotgun and flee the home. They make their way to the Pine Hills Shopping Center, firing away at all the infected all the way. They stop at a house by the roadside to rest and wakes up to realize they are surrounded by armed men in uniform. They are taken to a room (possibly an ambulance) and forcibly injected. When they wake up and look around, they overhear that they have committed a massacre at Pine Hill shopping mall and now being charged for the crimes.

text: It misses to mention the narrator escape attempts.

refinement: The story starts with the narrator waking and taking a look at the mirror, they realize they are in trouble as his roommate had been infected and is rotting away. They take their survival kit and a shotgun and flee the home. They make their way to the Pine Hills Shopping Center, firing away at all the infected all the way. They stop at a house by the roadside to rest and wakes up to realize they are surrounded by armed men in uniform. They are taken to a room (possibly an ambulance) and forcibly injected. When they wake up and look around, they overhear that they have committed a massacre at Pine Hill shopping mall and now being charged for the crimes. After a failed escape attempt, the narrator sees another way out and commits suicide.

answer:
Mitchell wakes up and reaches the bathroom to see his roommate's body get infected. Afraid, he flees the house with his survival kit and reaches Pine Hills shopping centre. He notices everyone around him rotting away and starts firing bullets at them and runs away.

He reaches a house and stays there for the night. He wakes up strapped to a table and tries to flee from there. But he is stopped by three men who inject him. They are later heard saying that Mitchell has murdered 83 men and suffers from Post-Traumatic Stress hence, would remain in Northwood asylum.

text: It misses to mention the narrator escape attempts.

refinement:
Mitchell wakes up and reaches the bathroom to see his roommate's body get infected. Afraid, he flees the house with his survival kit and reaches Pine Hills shopping centre. He notices everyone around him rotting away and starts firing bullets at them and runs away.
He reaches a house and stays there for the night. He wakes up strapped to a table and tries to flee from there but is stopped by three men who inject him. They are later heard saying that Mitchell has murdered 83 men and suffers from Post-Traumatic Stress hence, would remain in Northwood asylum. After a failed escape attempt, the narrator sees another way out and commits suicide.

answer: The protagonist wakes up surrounded by rotting corpses. Her roommate has become infected, and she flees from their house in terror. She finds refuge in a deserted house, only to be captured by guards who charge her with murder. She escapes, only to find herself in a dead end. She decides to commit suicide instead of being captured again.

text: It incorrectly describes the narrator as a woman, however it is Mitchell Cameron

refinement: The protagonist wakes up surrounded by rotting corpses. His roommate has become infected, and he flees from their house in terror. He finds refuge in a deserted house, only to be captured by guards who charge him with murder. He escapes, only to find himself in a dead end. He decides to commit suicide instead of being captured again.

text: It misses to mention the massacre at Pine Hills shopping center.

refinement: The protagonist wakes up to his roommate being infected and rotting away. He flees from their house in terror and at the Pine Hill shopping centre he begins to fire away at all the zombies. He finds refuge in a deserted house, only to be captured by guards who charge him with murder. He escapes, only to find himself in a dead end. He decides to commit suicide instead of being captured again.

text: It misses to mention what the narrator is charged for and what he's suffering from.

refinement: The protagonist wakes up to his roommate being infected and rotting away. He flees from their house in terror and at the Pine Hill shopping centre he begins to fire away at all the zombies. He finds refuge in a deserted house, only to be captured by guards who charge him with the murder of 83 people. The narrator overhears the men saying that he is suffering from PTSD and would remain in the mental asylum. He escapes, only to find himself in a dead end. He decides to commit suicide instead of being captured again.

answer: A man's roommate begins to rot away from his body into a grotesque creature. The man grabs his survival kit and leaves the house. As he travels through the city, everyone is rotten and infected. He's bayoneted multiple times, but he keeps on going. Eventually, a group of men in white bring him to a white room and subdue him. After he wakes up strapped to a table, he takes his life.

text: There's no evidence that suggest that the narrator's roommate begins to rot away into a creature.

refinement: The narrator's roommate begins to rot away from his body after being infected. The narrator grabs his survival kit and shotgun and leaves the house. As he travels through the city, everyone is rotten and infected. He's bayoneted multiple times, but he keeps on going. Eventually, a group of men in white bring him to a white room and subdue him. After he wakes up strapped to a table, he takes his life.

text: It misses mentioning the massacre at the Pine Hills shopping center.

refinement: The narrator's roommate begins to rot away from his body after being infected. The narrator grabs his survival kit and shotgun and leaves the house. As he travels through the city and into the Pine Hills shopping center, everyone is rotten and infected and he begins to fire away at all of them. He's bayoneted multiple times, but he keeps on going. Eventually, a group of men in white bring him to a white room and subdue him. After he wakes up strapped to a table, he takes his life.

text: It misses mentioning the narrator escape attempts and the charges against him.

refinement: The narrator's roommate begins to rot away from his body after being infected. The narrator grabs his survival kit and shotgun and leaves the house. As he travels through the city and into the Pine Hills shopping center, everyone is rotten and infected and he begins to fire away at all of them. He's bayoneted multiple times, but he keeps on going. Eventually, a group of men in white bring him to a white room and subdue him. He overhears the men saying that he's being charged for the massacre of 83 people and is suffering from PTSD. After he wakes up strapped to a table again, he breaks free and takes his life.


title: A Tropico Inspired writing, A bit of the Introduction

question: How serious is the story?

text: Blank response.

refinement: The story seems to be half serious and said with cheek.

answer: The story is quite serious, with violence and poverty being prevalent throughout.

text: The story reads with a bit of cheek to it, so to say that it's quite serious is inaccurate. Violence and poverty doesn't always mean something is serious or grim.

refinement: The story is quite serious, with violence and poverty being prevalent throughout.

answer: Comes across as quite sarcastic.

text: It seems the narrator is only half being sarcastic. It would be more accurate to say say the narrator is describing the country with a bit of cheek.

refinement: Comes across as half sarcastic, describing the country with a bit of cheek.

answer: The narrator is making fun of the country.

question: Who is the narrator's "gringo friend?"

answer: The narrator's "gringo friend" is the reader.

text: "Rest assure my gringo friend, you’re on a strip of land along the Caribbean shores of Central America but I cannot assure you your safety." The use of second person corroborates this.

answer: The narrator's gringo friend is the reader.

text: "Rest assure my gringo friend, you’re on a strip of land along the Caribbean shores of Central America but I cannot assure you your safety." The use of second person corroborates this.

answer: The narrator's "gringo friend" is someone who is visiting the small country of Morazan, which is located along the Caribbean coastline of Central America.

text: It's omitted that the "gringo friend" is the reader. This is evident with the story's use of second person.

refinement: The narrator's "gringo friend" is the reader, who is visiting the small country of Morazan, which is located along the Caribbean coastline of Central America.

text: The location of Morazon is irrelevant to the question.

refinement: The narrator's "gringo friend" is the reader, who is visiting the small country of Morazan.

answer: The reader.

text: "Rest assure my gringo friend, you’re on a strip of land along the Caribbean shores of Central America but I cannot assure you your safety." The use of second person corroborates this.

question: What does the narrator juxtapose with the beautiful, tropical surroundings?

answer: The narrator juxtaposes the beautiful, tropical surroundings with the violence and poverty that exists in the country.

text: "Welcome my gringo friend, to the small country of Morazan, where your horrors and your dreams collide," is one example that supports the answer.

answer: The threat of violence, burning garbage.

text: "Welcome my gringo friend, to the small country of Morazan, where your horrors and your dreams collide," is one example that supports the answer.

text: Blank response.

refinement: The narrator juxtaposes the beautiful backdrop with violence, crime, and garbage.

answer: The narrator juxtaposes the beautiful, tropical surroundings with the horrors of the country.

text: "Welcome my gringo friend, to the small country of Morazan, where your horrors and your dreams collide," is one example that supports the answer.

question: Is Morazan a real country?

answer: Yes, Morazan is a real country located in Central America along the Caribbean coastline. It has a high murder rate and is rife with poverty and crime.

text: It is not a real country, and the information can't be found in the story.

refinement: This information can't be found in the story.

answer: Seems to be a historically relevant name for central America, even some places named after it, but no country.

answer: It is not clear.

answer: Yes, Morazan is a real country.

text: It is not a real country, and the information can't be found in the story.

refinement: The information can't be found in the story.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: Morazan is a small country along the Caribbean coast of Central America, where the beautiful beaches are overshadowed by the high murder rate and poverty. The locals enjoy festivities that involve human sacrifice, and the air is often filled with the smell of burning garbage.

text: There are only two sentences instead of the requested four. It's omitted that the narrator is warning the reader.

refinement: The narrator warns the reader about Morazon, a small country along the Caribbean coast of Central America where the beautiful beaches are overshadowed by the high murder rate and poverty. The locals enjoy festivities that involve human sacrifice, and the air is often filled with the smell of burning garbage.

text: It's omitted that the narrator describes Morazon as "where your horrors and your dreams collide".

refinement: The narrator warns the reader about Morazon, a small country along the Caribbean coast of Central America where the beautiful beaches are overshadowed by the high murder rate and poverty. The locals enjoy festivities that involve human sacrifice, and the air is often filled with the smell of burning garbage. The narrator describes Morazon as "where your horrors and your dreams collide".

answer:
Imagine a beautiful paradise somewhere, let’s say along the Caribbean coastline of Central America. You’re there, embracing the cool ocean breeze amid the tropical palm trees and cool moist breeze of the ocean wind. You enjoy a freshly liberated coconut with the little straw on top to suck away at its very essence. Your feet begin to sink into the soft golden sand, so golden in fact that when the conquistadors arrived along the shores hundreds of years ago, they mistake it for gold itself! All you hear during all this are the constantly crashing waves amid the shore by the light blue ocean. The smell of fresh salt water permeates the air while you shelter yourself under one of those tall palm trees enjoying that very final residue of coconut water. Exploited to the very end, you finish the coconut and soon, other senses begin to take over.

Where to start? Rest assure my gringo friend, you’re on a strip of land along the Caribbean shores of Central America but I cannot assure you your safety. Those beaches are looking quite nice despite the history here but your vacation might end rather soon when the local drug gangs ask for your wallet.  Hopefully you’re not murdered on that same beach since unlike our compeneros in Honduras with a murder rate of 82.1 per 100,000, we have a murder rate somewhere around 83.1 per 100,000. Then again, I personally wouldn’t mind spending my last moments on those shores, perhaps I can fool myself like those conquistadors into thinking it was gold. I would die a rich man on this golden coast!

You hear that sound in the air? Well, the sound of crashing waves along the shores is one thing but the gunshots are another. Perhaps to calm your nerves a bit, those are just fireworks, yes, just fireworks because here, we have celebrations that involve some ancient Aztec tradition in which we ceremoniously sacrifice maybe one or two people per day so that the beautiful tropical sun can rise once more! Exotic no? Well, I just recommend you don’t go anywhere near those proceedings or for that matter take pictures.

You smell the salty sea? Well, maybe you’re imagining things a bit too hard because just 100 yards away from you, there is a giant pile of burning garbage. The acrid smell of garbage from the nearby dilapidated housing of our…..lower income residence can be quite strong to the nostrils. Oh, and that coconut you’re drinking, that was imported from Costa Rica since we don’t have any coconuts here! Welcome my gringo friend, to the small country of Morazan, where your horrors and your dreams collide!

text: This is not a summary. This is the entire story.

text: Blank response.

refinement: The narrator paints a picture of a tropical getaway in Central America, with golden sand, a blue ocean, and coconut water. Then they reveal a serious threat of violence from drug cartels, murders, and gunshots. There are garbage fires yards from the beach. He describes Morazan as a country where "your horrors and your dreams collide!"

answer: The narrator describes a beautiful paradise along the Caribbean coastline of Central America. They warn the reader that the beaches are looking nice despite the history of the area. The narrator describes the local drug gangs and the murder rate. They describe the local celebrations and the giant pile of burning garbage.

text: Change "are looking nice" to "look nice". It reads awkwardly.

refinement: The narrator describes a beautiful paradise along the Caribbean coastline of Central America. They warn the reader that the beaches look nice despite the history of the area. The narrator describes the local drug gangs and the murder rate. They describe the local celebrations and the giant pile of burning garbage.

text: Combine the third and fourth sentence for increased flow. Add as a fourth sentence that the narrator describes the country of Morazon as "where your horrors and your dreams collide".

refinement: The narrator describes a beautiful paradise along the Caribbean coastline of Central America. They warn the reader that the beaches look nice despite the history of the area. The narrator describes the local drug gangs, the murder rate, local celebrations, and the giant pile of burning garbage. The narrator describes the country of Morazon as "where your horrors and your dreams collide".

answer: The narrator paints a picture of a lovely tropical getaway in Central America, with golden sand, blue ocean, and coconut water. Then they reveal a serious threat of violence from drug cartels, murders, gunshots. They reveal that there are garbage fires yards from the beach. That in fact, Morazan is a country where "your horrors and your dreams collide!"

text: Add "and" between "murders" and "gunshots"

refinement: The narrator paints a picture of a lovely tropical getaway in Central America, with golden sand, blue ocean, and coconut water. Then they reveal a serious threat of violence from drug cartels, murders, and gunshots. They reveal that there are garbage fires yards from the beach. That in fact, Morazan is a country where "your horrors and your dreams collide!"