text:
  All of us have a muse. Just be thankful that most us can't see them.  She's been with me, as long as I can remember, a pale woman, never a girl, always just a few steps away from me, no matter where I am. She never speaks to me. Not in words that I can hear, but I can feel her in my mind, when I sit down to write, when the ideas start to flow.

  When I was little, I used to try to convince my mother of Her reality, it was always dismissed as a game, a little bit of play acting. She had an imaginary friend when she was young too she'd say with a smile. After a while I could see the worry on her face whenever I mentioned “The Woman.” - I never really had a name for Her, didn't understand what exactly She was, I didn't have the words. Not back then. - And so I let it drop. I stopped mentioning Her, started to try ignoring Her, though as I got older this grew more difficult.

  I'd see Her every time I looked over my shoulder, every time I looked in the mirror, and I soon came to realize that She was beautiful, Her plump lips always slightly upturned as if we were sharing some private joke. Though this smile never seemed to reach Her eyes which were a pale shade of green, always fixing onto mine when I looked at Her. Her hair long, and richly black, and She always wore the same long green dress, old fashioned, like something from a story book without the lace and the ruffles.

  I've always been creative but mercurial, my passions shifting from one pursuit to the other, first drawing, then painting, playing instruments, anything that involves an expression of myself. But my true love has always been writing. When I write I lose myself in the story, it pours out of me like a torrent. I'm almost never at a loss for words. But I find it so draining. A few hours of writing and I feel like I've been working a full day, bone tired fatigued. And I never really understood why until I was in my late teens.

  I was home from school and rattling around my empty house, Mom was working and Dad was out of state. So I decided to go down to the local coffee shop and try to get some work done. There'd been a particularly complex story that I'd been working on, my first real attempt at a novel, and I wanted some time to proofread, but I didn't like being alone with Her. As I pushed through the doors of the shop, I noticed something odd. A man who looked to be in his late fifties sitting and typing feverishly, this in itself wasn't strange. But what was behind him was...There was a woman standing there, similar enough to mine to be her twin, the same generous features, the same green eyes, but her hair was red, a brilliant fiery red. As he wrote she leaned in close her lips pressing against his ears, her hands resting on his shoulders, she seemed to be whispering something, though he was not responding, simply typing away. I started to approach them, to talk to him, to her, but then I saw her nails. They were long, curving slightly downwards, sinking into his flesh through his shirt and as I watched I could see a faint pulsing glow rising upwards along them, from him into her and he began to droop visibly, reaching to take a deep sip of his coffee, fatigue suddenly registering on his features.

  I fled as soon as my mind registered this, pushed back out the doors and ran all the way home. I didn't stop till I was in my room, throwing myself beneath the covers and hiding there for all the good it would do me. They looked so much alike, that strange woman and my Muse, was She doing the same to me? I let the idea go, tried not to thing about it. To force it out of my head then one day on the front page of the paper I saw a story about a local writer who had died “tragically early.” The picture was of the man I'd seen at the coffee shop just a few months previously. His age was listed as thirty-five, but he'd apparently been quite prolific, eight novels to his name. The cause of death was hear attack. This couldn't be right I told myself, from the picture alone he seemed to be on the cusp of seniority, sixty I would have believed. I went to the computer, googling his name, confident the paper had been a typo. It was not. The information was accurate. There were all kinds of theories about his appearance, about his gray hair, including drugs, but I knew better. It was her, it was whatever she had been taking from him. And I now knew what I had to do. I had to see if She was doing the same to me as his woman had done to him. I had to know. I set up a mirror on my desk, she never appeared on film, placed it just in front of myself, so I could glance up at a moments notice and I began to write. Nothing at first, my interest more on staring at the mirror, trying to catch her then the act of writing itself. But finally I found the rhythm of it, the words pouring forth once more. And I glanced up. And I saw Her, looking back at me. Her nails in my flesh, her lips on my ear, I could have been the man in that shop in that moment. I threw the notebook away from me, vowed never to write another word, hoping to starve her.

  But the ideas, they just kept coming, flooding into my consciousness at the worst moments, drowning out everything else. I lasted a little over a year till I had to give up. I sat down at my PC, and I typed, for hours, the words flowing forth like a river breaking a dam. When I finished I could barely move the short distance from my chair to my bed. I collapsed, not even having the energy to pull the sheets over me and woke sixteen hours later, the bed beneath me, and my clothes soaked with sweat, my entire body aching.
I dragged myself out of bed and into the bathroom, trying to tell myself it was nothing, just a fever, it couldn't be anything else Then I looked into the mirror, and I found the first streak of gray. I was sixteen. My mother nearly fainted when I came downstairs, she immediately drove me to the doctor. He told us he couldn't find anything wrong, said it was probably just stress, nothing to worry about and sent me home.

  I learned my lesson then. I didn't try to bottle it up anymore...Eight years later, that's still my only streak of gray, but I easily pass for thirty. My face is lined my bones ache. Every time I set pen to paper or finger to key she feels a bit more solid, I can feel her touch even now, feel her lips brushing against my skin. It's addictive, her presence. Comforting almost. feel a little bit of myself flowing out of me every-time I write but I can't stop.  I don't want to stop, and I know that She'll take me if I do, I'm sure of it. She'll take me all at once instead of in pieces, my face the next in the paper.

title: My Muse

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the supernatural elements of the story.

answer: The narrator has a muse, a pale woman who is always just a few steps away from him, no matter where he is. She never speaks to him, but he can feel her in his mind when he writes. He also sees a woman who looks like his muse, but is much more sinister, doing something to a local writer.

text: The response should include that the narrator knows that the other woman causes the local writer's death.

refinement: The narrator has a muse, a pale woman who is always just a few steps away from him, no matter where he is. She never speaks to him, but he can feel her in his mind when he writes. He also sees a woman who looks like his muse, but is much more sinister, doing something to a local writer. The writer ends up dying a few days later of a heart attack.

text: The response is missing the woman's further interactions with the narrator.

refinement: The narrator has a muse, a pale woman who is always just a few steps away from him, no matter where he is. She never speaks to him, but he can feel her in his mind when he writes. He also sees a woman who looks like his muse, but is much more sinister, doing something to a local writer. The writer ends up dying a few days later of a heart attack. Eventually, the narrator almost falls prey to the woman; he ends up with a grey streak in his hair at 16.

answer: The narrator has a muse, a pale woman who is always just a few steps away from him, no matter where he is. She never speaks to him, but he can feel her in his mind when he writes. The narrator also sees a woman who looks like his muse, but is much more sinister, doing something to a local writer.

text: same as response 1

refinement: The narrator has a muse, a pale woman who is always just a few steps away from him, no matter where he is. She never speaks to him, but he can feel her in his mind when he writes. He also sees a woman who looks like his muse, but is much more sinister, doing something to a local writer. The writer ends up dying a few days later of a heart attack. Eventually, the narrator almost falls prey to the woman; he ends up with a grey streak in his hair at 16.

answer: The narrator's mysterious muse instills fatigue in his body every time he writes. While he was in high school, he noticed a woman in her late fifties also in Starbucks writing with a younger man. After the man dies, he notices him shortly later with the same woman. The woman seems to be taking a part of the man's consciousness. Over time, the muse develops a physical form and the narrator becomes her next victim. Then, he learns to accept her in fear of continuing the cycle.

text: There are several inaccuracies in the highlighted portion of the response. The man he sees in the coffeeshop is the one who looks like he is in his 50s, not the woman. After the news about the man's death breaks, the narrator sees the woman again, not the man who died.

refinement: The narrator's mysterious muse instills fatigue in his body every time he writes. While he was in high school, he noticed a young woman hovering over a fifty-something year old man writing in Starbucks. After the news breaks that the same man dies at 35, he notices her hovering over the narrator as he writes.  The woman seems to be taking a part of the man's consciousness. Over time, the muse develops a physical form and the narrator becomes her next victim. Then, he learns to accept her in fear of continuing the cycle.

text: The muse has always had a physical form. The narrator is slowly falling into the trap of the muse.

refinement: The narrator's mysterious muse instills fatigue in his body every time he writes. While he was in high school, he noticed a young woman hovering over a fifty-something year old man writing in Starbucks. After the news breaks that the same man dies at 35, he notices her hovering over the narrator as he writes.  The woman seems to be taking a part of his consciousness. The narrator almost falls prey to the woman; he ends up with a grey streak in his hair at 16.

answer: The narrator has a muse, a pale woman who never speaks to him but he can feel her in his mind when he writes. She is always a few steps away from him. The narrator can see her in the mirror and when he looks over his shoulder. She is beautiful and he always sees her in the same long green dress. The narrator can see her in the mirror. She is a supernatural creature who drains the life out of people by feeding off of their creative energy.

text: The response should include that the narrator sees a similar woman hovering over a man in a coffeeshop, and he ends up dying a few days later at the age of 35. The response should also include that the narrator almost falls prey to the woman, and ends up with a grey streak in his hair.

refinement: The narrator has a muse, a pale woman who never speaks to him but he can feel her in his mind when he writes. She is always a few steps away from him. The narrator can see her in the mirror and when he looks over his shoulder. She is beautiful and he always sees her in the same long green dress. The narrator can see her in the mirror. She is a supernatural creature who drains the life out of people by feeding off of their creative energy. The narrator sees a similar woman hovering over a man in a coffeeshop; the same man dies a while later at the age of 35. The narrator almost falls prey to the woman and ends up with a grey streak in his hair.

answer: The woman kills the man as the author sees her symptoms in the older man after they ran into each other. The woman follows the author, providing inspiration but draining energy. The author also sees a man killed by the same woman based on her description of her powers.

text: The highlighted portion of the response is incoherent and should be removed.

refinement: The woman follows the author, providing inspiration but draining energy. The author also sees a man killed by the same woman based on her description of her powers.

text: The response is missing many pieces of information about the woman, including her appearance and the effect of her presence.

refinement: The narrator has a muse, a pale woman who never speaks to him but he can feel her in his mind when he writes. The woman follows the author, providing inspiration but draining energy. She is always a few steps away from him. The narrator can see her in the mirror and when he looks over his shoulder. She is beautiful and he always sees her in the same long green dress. The narrator can see her in the mirror. She is a supernatural creature who drains the life out of people by feeding off of their creative energy. The narrator sees a similar woman hovering over a man in a coffeeshop; the same man dies a while later at the age of 35. The narrator almost falls prey to the woman and ends up with a grey streak in his hair.

answer: The woman follows the author, providing inspiration but draining energy. The author also sees a man killed by the same woman based on her description of her powers.

text: The response is missing many pieces of information about the woman, including her appearance and the effect of her presence.

refinement: The narrator has a muse, a pale woman who never speaks to him but he can feel her in his mind when he writes. The woman follows the author, providing inspiration but draining energy. She is always a few steps away from him. The narrator can see her in the mirror and when he looks over his shoulder. She is beautiful and he always sees her in the same long green dress. The narrator can see her in the mirror. She is a supernatural creature who drains the life out of people by feeding off of their creative energy. The narrator sees a similar woman hovering over a man in a coffeeshop; the same man dies a while later at the age of 35. The narrator almost falls prey to the woman and ends up with a grey streak in his hair.

answer: The narrator has a muse, a pale woman who never speaks to him but he can feel her in his mind when he writes. She is always a few steps away from him. The narrator can see her in the mirror and when he looks over his shoulder. She is beautiful and he always sees her in the same long green dress. The narrator can see her in the mirror.

text: The response is missing key pieces of information about what the woman does to the narrator.

refinement: The narrator has a muse, a pale woman who never speaks to him but he can feel her in his mind when he writes. She is always a few steps away from him. The narrator can see her in the mirror and when he looks over his shoulder. She is beautiful and he always sees her in the same long green dress. The narrator can see her in the mirror. The woman seems to drain the life out of people that she interacts with. The narrator almost falls prey to the woman, but ends up only with a grey streak in his hair.

text: The response is missing information about a similar woman that seems to kill a man that the narrator sees in a coffee shop.

refinement: The narrator has a muse, a pale woman who never speaks to him but he can feel her in his mind when he writes. She is always a few steps away from him. The narrator can see her in the mirror and when he looks over his shoulder. She is beautiful and he always sees her in the same long green dress. The narrator can see her in the mirror. The woman seems to drain the life out of people that she interacts with. The narrator sees a similar woman hovering over a seemingly older man in a coffee shop one day. A little while later, the man dies at the age of 35. The narrator almost falls prey to the woman, but ends up only with a grey streak in his hair.

answer: The narrator's mysterious muse instills fatigue in his body every time he writes. While he was in high school, he noticed a woman in her late fifties also in Starbucks writing with a younger man. Then, he finds out the man died in his sleep when pressured to work incessantly by pulling the energy from the man much like a vampire. The woman seems to be taking a part of the man's consciousness. Over time, the muse develops a physical form and the narrator becomes her next victim. Then, he learns to accept her in fear of continuing the cycle.

text: Same as response 3

refinement: The narrator's mysterious muse instills fatigue in his body every time he writes. While he was in high school, he noticed a young woman hovering over a fifty-something year old man writing in Starbucks. After the news breaks that the same man dies at 35, he notices her hovering over the narrator as he writes.  The woman seems to be taking a part of his consciousness. The narrator almost falls prey to the woman; he ends up with a grey streak in his hair at 16.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about where the Muse came from?

answer: The story doesn't say where the muse came from but it can be implied that the Muse originated from the other woman sharing the man with the narrator.

text: The passage does not say or imply anything about the origin on the muse.

refinement: The story doesn't say where the muse came from.

answer: No answer

answer: The Muse is a mysterious entity that has been with the narrator since they were a child, but she has never been seen. The narrator believes the Muse is a woman who takes the life force of all the writers she meets.

text: The narrator sees the muse often. The passage also does not state or imply her origin.

answer: No answer

answer: No answer

answer: No answer

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about the benefits of the Muse?

answer: The narrator is a writer, so presumably the Muse gives him inspiration for his stories. Suffering writers block is not a major aspect of the story. The Muse does not cause the narrator to age prematurely but it can be assumed that the Muse is responsible for his accompanying ill health as well.

text: The highlighted portion off the response is unnecessary.

refinement: The narrator is a writer, so presumably the Muse gives him inspiration for his stories. The Muse does not cause the narrator to age prematurely but it can be assumed that the Muse is responsible for his accompanying ill health as well.

text: The muse does in fact cause the narrator to age prematurely, as evidenced by his grey hair. Beyond that, premature aging and poor health are not benefits, but rather detriments. The sentences should be removed.

refinement: The narrator is a writer, so presumably the Muse gives him inspiration for his stories.

text: The response is missing information from the passage that answers the question.

refinement: The narrator is a writer, so presumably the Muse gives him inspiration for his stories. The more the narrator attempts to write, the more often he sees the muse.

answer: The Muse is the writer's muse. She's been with him since he was a child. She's beautiful, but she's also dangerous. She gives him ideas and makes him write, but she also takes his life away. She's a muse, but she's also a demon.

text: The highlighted portion of the response is unnecessary.

refinement: The Muse is the writer's muse. She's been with him since he was a child. She's beautiful, but she's also dangerous. She gives him ideas and makes him write, but she also takes his life away.

answer: The narrator feels it is a comfort whenever they are working or writing as they get to see her and connect with her through it.

text: The response is inaccurate. The muse and the narrator are never really connected; they have a parasitic relationship with each other. The muse feeds the narrator ideas to write about, but also drains his life from him.

refinement: The muse gives the narrator ideas to write, and allows him to write for hours at a time. However, in exchange, she drains his life away.

answer: The narrator feels a little bit of himself flowing out of him every time he writes. He gets to express himself and his creativity. He feels like he's at his best when he's writing. He says that he feels a little bit of himself flowing out of him every time he writes, which could be a sign that he's losing his life force to the Muse.

text: The response does not answer the question.

refinement: The muse gives the narrator ideas to write, and allows him to write for hours at a time. However, in exchange, she drains his life away.

answer: The Muse is the writer's muse. She's been with him since he was a child. She's beautiful, but she's also dangerous. She gives him ideas and makes him write, but she also takes his life away. She's a muse, but she's also a demon. The Muse is also an addicting force that keeps him writing.

text: The response contains repetitive and unnecessary information.

refinement: The Muse is the writer's muse. She's been with him since he was a child. She's beautiful, but she's also dangerous. She gives him ideas and makes him write, but she also takes his life away. The Muse is an addicting force that keeps him writing.

answer: The narrator is a writer, so presumably the Muse gives him inspiration for his stories. Suffering writers block is not a major aspect of the story. The Muse does give the narrator trouble in that she saps his energy. He ages prematurely, so it can be assumed that the Muse is responsible for his accompanying ill health as well.

text: The highlighted portion is unnecessary.

refinement: The narrator is a writer, so presumably the Muse gives him inspiration for his stories. The Muse does give the narrator trouble in that she saps his energy. He ages prematurely, so it can be assumed that the Muse is responsible for his accompanying ill health as well.

answer: The narrator feels a little bit of himself flowing out of him every time he writes. He gets to express himself and his creativity. He feels like he's at his best when he's writing. He says that he feels a little bit of himself flowing out of him every time he writes, which could be a sign that he's losing his life force to the Muse. He says that the Muse is addictive and he can't stop writing.

text: same as response 4

refinement: The muse gives the narrator ideas to write, and allows him to write for hours at a time. However, in exchange, she drains his life away.


split: train

text:
[decaying-villa-4]Recently, my husband sent me an article on abandoned places. These were once glorious, but now forsaken European castles and villas. Dying tokens of splendor and opulence captured by architectural photographer Mirna Pavlovic, who has a thing for deserted structures. She risks getting arrested, falling through rotted floors, or just plain getting cooties by climbing fences and ignoring “no trespassing” signs in order to get some truly incredible shots. Ones of beautiful homes that for reasons we can only imagine, have been ditched and left to slowly decay. Their murals,  marble and artisan carpentry are being encroached upon by the elements, until one day they will become part of the natural earth again.

“They are never truly dead, yet never really alive,” Pavlovic says of these villas. “Precariously treading along the border between life and death, decay and growth, the seen and the unseen, the past and the present, abandoned places confusingly encompass both at the same time, thus leaving the ordinary passerby overwhelmed with both attraction and revulsion.”

I love the duality she sees in these spaces. That the ghosts who visit while she snaps her pictures may tell a very different tale to her than to someone else. They might speak of folly, dancing, formality, and wing-dings. Or anguish, broken dreams, empty promises, death, hope, rebirth. Perhaps all of those things jumbled up into one, long Russian novel.

“Reminds me of the stories you write,” my husband told me.

And he has a point. It seems I cannot write a story without a double meaning or phantom of some sort. While Pavlovic focuses on place, I train my eye on people – emotion, memory, the senses. Picking apart and reassembling the interior mechanisms that conspire to make up a soul. Urging my imagination to recognize the spiritual components which make that soul eternal.[decaying-villa-3]It may seem counterintuitive, but I feel an inherent sense of optimism when I’m dreaming up characters who have been disavowed, betrayed, left behind to descend into ruin. From there, the only way is up. Thought by thought, step by step, decision by decision. Understanding this narrative is what gives life meaning. It opens our hearts to mercy.

So, I understand Pavlovic’s fixation.

The chronicling of this organic and at times supernatural metamorphosis is the sole reason I’ve never even considered giving up on being a fiction writer. Even when the frustration and fear of failure has been so great that it’s kept me up at night, found me tearing through my kitchen to cook up gourmet meals no one in my family really wants to eat, made me say mean things to my mother’s bird.

Because writing is so much more than a skill to me, or a way to do my part in keeping my kids ensconced in their expensive enrichment activities. Writing is an extension of faith, of compassion, of trying to leave behind something that will matter to someone else.

When I take time off from my stories for any extended period, I find myself averting my eyes from the ruined places and ruined souls that I would otherwise be exploring. Not because I can’t bear to look at them, but because I can’t spare the time. The hours in the day fill up with cooking and laundry and driving. And for a while, yes, the house looks better, our lives are more organized, our kids are always on time for their events.

Those intervals are important, too, and I’m not knocking them. Nor would I give them up.

But when they stretch out for too long, my interior life becomes a bit more stark. I might be a more competent wife and mother, but not necessarily a better one. I start to pick teams instead of examining issues. Ugly words begin to mean less, and even make me a little giddy. They feel like contraband – smoking a cigarette behind the shed doors.[decaying-villa]If I look away for too long, I start to give myself permission to retreat comfortably behind the sanctimony of political correctness, biblical passages, or quotes from my favorite philosophers – believing, wrongly, that I’ve got this empathy thing down. Smug in my place in the world, judgement and condescension worm their way into my daily thoughts. I have so much less to teach my children.

I don’t mean for it to happen, it’s something that creeps up – like the ivy in some of the mansions Pavlovic likes to photograph.

And that’s when I know.

It’s time to climb that fence again, march past the “no trespassing” sign, risk falling through a rotten floor and getting cooties in order to spend some time inside a soul – perhaps denied, friendless and pitiful, but still standing.[decaying-villa-5]

Read the article on Pavlovic’s amazing work here.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about the resemblance of deserted places and broken people?

answer: The article suggests that abandoned places, while beautiful, also share certain qualities with broken people. Both stark in their duality, abandoned places contain both the beauty and demise of the past, while broken people possess the possibility of both despair and hope. The author suggests that this truth encourages optimism, though oftentimes it gets lost due to busyness and self-mistrust.

answer: The author talks about Mirna Pavlovic's photography, who goes to great lengths to capture abandoned, decaying buildings that are neither dead nor alive. This is similar to the characters the author likes to write about in her stories, who are abandoned, betrayed, but still alive. She finds thinking about such people helps her stay humble and less judgmental. The author feels like she needs to go out in search of souls, just like Pavlovic searches for abandoned places.

answer: The article argues that deserts belong to valuable spaces that have been forsaken, neglected, or abandoned. Places or souls in a state of decay may seem dead within but are still not beyond hope and faith. It suggests that the location of despair is merely a precursor for hope.

text: The first and last sentences are inaccurate/irrelevant

refinement: Places or souls in a state of decay may seem dead within but are still not beyond hope and faith.

answer: The article suggests that abandoned places and broken people share a similar duality of life and death, decay and growth. Both must inhabit that precarious border between worlds. To the casual passerby, both abandoned places and broken people seem overwhelming due to their duality. While intact places seem alive, abandoned places and broken people hint at something beyond this life. In both cases, they represent potential for hope.

answer: There is no resemblance between deserted places and broken people. The only similarity is a sense of being out-of place. The roomfeeling out of place is common to all objects, houses, and people who are deserted or left to rot. This is very universal.

text: Completely inaccurate response

text: Provide a response

refinement: Deserted places and broken people are both on the border of life and death, decay and growth. They have both been left to descend into ruin, but have nowhere to go but up.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about humility and condescension?

answer: The article suggests that when one forgets to keep their empathy intact, they are likely to get arrogant and condescending in their thoughts. While periods of practicality and organization are beneficial, forgetting to examine grief, misery, and betrayal can lead to an inner complacency which ultimately undermines the empathy and compassion that is necessary for living a decent life.

answer: Humility and condescension are contrary emotions, the former an Act of self-effacement, the latter an Act of being proud of oneself. According to the article-writers, the author's hubris or breaking the sanctimony brings on tedium. This can be countered, the article says, by getting her mind off her self-absorption and ever-practicing self-judgement and return to help others and to submission to God.

text: The definitions of humility and condescension are unnecessary

refinement: Humility and condescension are contrary emotions. According to the article-writers, the author's hubris or breaking the sanctimony brings on tedium. This can be countered, the article says, by getting her mind off her self-absorption and ever-practicing self-judgement and return to help others and to submission to God.

text: "According to the article-writers" is unnecessary

refinement: Humility and condescension are contrary emotions. The author's hubris or breaking the sanctimony brings on tedium. This can be countered, the article says, by getting her mind off her self-absorption and ever-practicing self-judgement and return to help others and to submission to God.

text: Nothing is said about "submission to God"

refinement: Humility and condescension are contrary emotions. The author's hubris or breaking the sanctimony brings on tedium. This can be countered, the article says, by getting her mind off her self-absorption and ever-practicing self-judgement and return to help others.

answer: The author finds these two states of mind to be opposite to each other. Observation of broken souls helps the author to keep herself grounded, avoiding feeling sanctimonious and judgmental. The author likens the creeping sense of superiority when she doesn't observe how people fall apart to the creeping vines in Pavlovic's photography.

answer: The article explains that humility is an important part of empathy, and that when one becomes excessively smug, they also become less empathetic. As a result, they begin to lose sight of the profound nature of damaged souls. The article makes clear that looking away too much means there will likely be less understanding and compassion. Realizing this allows one to become more humble and empathetic once again.

answer: There's no possible way to ever write without these awful traits showing up. While the narrator focuses on place, so does the photographer Mirna for her humanity. The narrator calls it as an extension of faith, of compassion, of trying to leave behind something that will matter to someone else. If not done cautiously, the narrator falls into the pitfalls of stark and judgmental person; a holy hypocrite.

text: The narrator focuses on humanity; Mirna on places

refinement: There's no possible way to ever write without these awful traits showing up. While the narrator focuses on humanity, so does the photographer Mirna on deserted buildings. The narrator calls it as an extension of faith, of compassion, of trying to leave behind something that will matter to someone else. If not done cautiously, the narrator falls into the pitfalls of stark and judgmental person; a holy hypocrite.

text: The first sentence is not supported

refinement: While the narrator focuses on humanity, so does the photographer Mirna on deserted buildings. The narrator calls it as an extension of faith, of compassion, of trying to leave behind something that will matter to someone else. If not done cautiously, the narrator falls into the pitfalls of stark and judgmental person; a holy hypocrite.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the author's narrative style in her fictional works.

answer: The author uses organic metaphors in order to highlight the duality of ruin and life that she sees in abandoned places. In her fiction, she seeks to explore the duality of loss and hope in the souls of her characters who have been disavowed, betrayed, or left behind to descend into ruin. The author's focal point is to underscore the importance of compassion, empathy and imagination in understanding the human condition.

text: The narrator writes about people, not abandoned places

refinement: The author uses organic metaphors in order to highlight the duality of ruin and life that she sees in characters who have been left in ruin. In her fiction, she seeks to explore the duality of loss and hope in the souls of her characters who have been disavowed, betrayed, or left behind to descend into ruin. The author's focal point is to underscore the importance of compassion, empathy and imagination in understanding the human condition.

answer: The author describes them as: thought by thought, step by step, decision by decision. Understanding this narrative is what gives life meaning. It opens our hearts to mercy.

text: Not sure this response makes any sense

text: Provide a response

refinement: The author's works tend to focus on people who have been disavowed, betrayed, or left behind to descend into ruin.

answer: The author describes in her works how her characters go through trials and tribulations, only to revert to a better place along their growth. She describes this narrative style as the "tell" as well. She says that when someone is injured it is natural to feel sorry but this sympathy is what makes us better people, so her fiction seeks to express and transmit this compassion to her readers. She feels that people are natural good and this perception is what can make good fiction great.

text: What is the "tell?"

refinement: The author describes in her works how her characters go through trials and tribulations, only to revert to a better place along their growth. She says that when someone is injured it is natural to feel sorry but this sympathy is what makes us better people, so her fiction seeks to express and transmit this compassion to her readers. She feels that people are natural good and this perception is what can make good fiction great.

answer: The author believes writing is an extension of empathy. Her works focus primarily on examining the lives of people who have been denied, betrayed, or left behind in ruin. The emphasis is on understanding and exploring, seeking the potential for hope and growth within those souls. Her style is primarily empathetic and optimistic, even when she may be tempted to retreat into more comfortable thoughts.

answer: She habitually looks for how people break down and recover, examining them to figure out how their souls work. She writes about people who are at the lowest points in their lives. The decisions and thoughts that lead her characters to recover are something she finds hopeful. This exercise, the author finds, allows mercy to come to fruition.


text:
01 November at 23:45

Napoli's Algerian full-back Faouzi Ghoulam was forced to come off due to an injury midway through the first halfwhen the Partenopei hosted Manchester City in the group stages of the Champions League.

The first reports from Sky Sports and Mediaset Premium are hardly any consolation for Maurizio Sarri either. Both Italian outlets report that the first examinations conducted tonight indicate that the Algerian international has suffered an injury to the cruciate ligaments in his right knee.

According to both reports the player will undergo a full medical examination tomorrow afternoon when the final verdict is expected as Napoli hold their breath to see how long they will have to be without one of the Serie A's best full-backs for the past few seasons.

  _Nima Tavallaey Roodsari_

question: What is the relationship between Maurizio Sarri and Napoli?

answer: It is not stated.

answer: It is not stated explicitly in the text, but it can be inferred that he is the Napoli team's manager.

answer: From the passage, it is clear that Maurizio Sarri is the manager of Napoli.

text: It is incorrectly stated that the information is clear from the passage.

refinement: It is not clearly stated in the passage but it seems like Maurizio Sarri is the manager of Napoli.

answer: The passage does not mention any relationship between Maurizio Sarri and Napoli.

question: What is Partenopei?

answer: It is the name of the football team that Faouzi Ghoulam plays for.

answer: It can be another name used for the Napoli football team.

answer: Partenopei is the name of the team that Faouzi Ghoulam plays for.

answer: Napoli's Algerian full-back Faouzi Ghoulam was forced to come off due to an injury midway through the first half when the Partenopei hosted Manchester City in the group stages of the Champions League.

text: This response is not related.

text: Answer missing.

refinement: The passage does not explicitly state what Partenopei is but it seems like it may be another name for the team.

question: Why did Faouzi Ghoulam come off midway through the match with Manchester City?

answer: Faouzi Ghoulam came off midway through the match with Manchester City because he had an injury to the cruciate ligaments in his right knee.

text: It isn't confirmed that the cruciate ligament is injured.

refinement: Faouzi Ghoulam came off midway through the match with Manchester City because he had an injury, likely to the cruciate ligaments in his right knee.

answer: According to reports, Ghoulam suffered an injury to his right knee, likely to be a cruciate ligament injury.

answer: He suffered an injury to the cruciate ligaments in his right knee.

text: It isn't confirmed that he suffered an injury to the cruciate ligament.

refinement: It is likely that he suffered an injury to the cruciate ligaments in his right knee.

answer: First examinations indicated that he suffered an injury to the cruciate ligaments in this right knee.

question: Is Faouzi Ghoulam good?

answer: Yes, Faouzi Ghoulam is good.

text: The passage does not specifically state whether he is good or not.

refinement: The passage does not explicitly say whether Faouzi Ghoulam is good. Although his injury may keep him out of the sport for a significant amount of time.

answer: Based on the information in the passage, it is difficult to say definitively whether or not Faouzi Ghoulam is good. However, the reports indicate that he may have suffered a serious injury, which could potentially keep him out for a significant amount of time.

answer: Yes, he is one of the best full-backs in Serie A for the past few seasons.

text: "Napoli hold their breath to see how long they will have to be without one of the Serie A's best full-backs for the past few seasons." This is evidence that he is a good player.

answer: Yes, he is one of the best full-backs in Serie A.

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: Faouzi Ghoulam, a full-back for Napoli, was forced to come off due to an injury midway through the first half when the Partenopei hosted Manchester City in the group stages of the Champions League. The first reports from Sky Sports and Mediaset Premium are that the Algerian international has suffered an injury to the cruciate ligaments in his right knee.

text: It is omitted that he will undergo further examination tomorrow.

refinement: Faouzi Ghoulam, a full-back for Napoli, was forced to come off due to an injury midway through the first half when the Partenopei hosted Manchester City in the group stages of the Champions League. The first reports from Sky Sports and Mediaset Premium are that the Algerian international has suffered an injury to the cruciate ligaments in his right knee, he will undergo further examination tomorrow.

answer: According to reports, it appears that Napoli's Faouzi Ghoulam has suffered a serious knee injury, potentially a cruciate ligament injury, and will undergo further examination tomorrow.

answer: Faouzi Ghoulam was injured midway through Napoli's Serie A game against Manchester City. He is one of the best full-backs in Serie A for the past few seasons.

text: It is omitted that the injury is likely to the cruciate ligament in his right knee.

refinement: Faouzi Ghoulam's cruciate ligament in his right knee was injured midway through Napoli's Serie A game against Manchester City. He is one of the best full-backs in Serie A for the past few seasons.

text: It is omitted that there will be further examination of the injury.

refinement: Faouzi Ghoulam's cruciate ligament in his right knee was injured midway through Napoli's Serie A game against Manchester City. He is one of the best full-backs in Serie A for the past few seasons. The injury will be further examined tomorrow.

answer: Faouzi Ghoulam, an Algerian full-back for Napoli, was forced to come off midway through the first half of a match against Manchester City due to an injury. The first reports indicate that he has suffered an injury to the cruciate ligaments in his right knee.

text: It is omitted that he will undergo further examination tomorrow.

refinement: Faouzi Ghoulam, an Algerian full-back for Napoli, was forced to come off midway through the first half of a match against Manchester City due to an injury. The first reports indicate that he has suffered an injury to the cruciate ligaments in his right knee, he will undergo further examination tomorrow.


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GARHI YASIN SINDH ( __, __) is a town and taluka of Shikarpur District, Sindh, Pakistan.

One of the three talukas (sub-districts) of Shikarpur, Garhi Yasin is of political and historical significance to Pakistan. On 1 June 1977 the old Shikarpur subdivision, consisting of the two talukas of Shikarpur and Garhiyasin, was separated from Sukkur District, and a new District Shikarpur was created and attached to Larkana Division.

Garhi Yasin is an extremely wealthy town located in the north of Sindh province of Pakistan. It is the second largest town of the district Shikarpur, having population of more than 14,000. Garhi Yasin is situated on the right bank of River Indus. Garhi Yasin region has always been important because of proximity of Shikarpur, a place that commanded the trade route through the Bolan Pass, and its merchants had dealings with many towns in Central Asia.

Garhi Yasin taluka comprises two main towns Dakhan, Madeji and some main villages Haji Rohelo Khan Jaffri, and Bado. Garhi Yasin has produced Politicians, Civil Servants, like Agha Siraj Khan Durrani, Speaker of Sindh assembly and Agha Rafique Khan Durrani former chief justice of sharia law and Chairman of the SPSC. The town is named after its founder Yasin Khan Pathan. Sindhi is the common language of the people in this region. The Jamali, Jaffri, Mangi, Marfani Kalhora, Mughal, Pirzada, Rajar, Seelro, Wadhio, Chandio, Memon, Sindhi Hindu, Soomra, Shaikh, Khakhrani, Syed, Mirani, Qazi, Bhutta, Lashari, Rahooja, Bhatti, Mahar, Jakhro, Kakepota, Arain, Mangi, Malik, Ghori, Rajpoot, Bhayo Tribe, Dharejo and Aawaan. With the Pathan (Durrani, Babar & Barak zai) From which the Durrani tribe being the strongest both politically and by land. After the independence from British India, Many Hindu and Sikh clans migrated to India. There also Hindus settled in Garhi Yasin. One of the Chiefs of Ghari Yasin; is Agha Affan Durrani holding tremendous political power and known to be influential all over the country.

Education

The town has a Higher Secondary School Agha Badaruddin Khan Durrani and three high schools, several primary schools, a Mono Technique School and a vocational School for typing, commercial, computer etc.

Agriculture

A considerable part of the area is irrigated. Major productions of the area are rice, wheat and pulses beside Maize, sugarcane, vegetables fruits etc.

Industry

It has a small market and manufactures of handicrafts, metal ware, furniture, bricks and pottery. Hand-loom weaving of the area used to be very popular. Rilly of Garhi Yasin is very popular in all over Sindh and making a good variety of Sindhi topi and Balochi Rilly in different models.

Land

It is chiefly alluvial plain. The lands are greatly suffered after construction of barrage at Sukkur and being rapidly converted into salt lands (Kalar). Waterlogging and salinity is a major problem of Garhi Yasin. The climate is very hot as it reached 49°C last year 2016, dry and enervating. Winter in mild and is best time to visit this town.

Category:Populated places in Sindh Category:Shikarpur District

title: Garhi Yasin

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about the demographics of Garhi Yasin?

answer: It is second largest town of the district Shikarpur, with a population of 14,000. Many different ethnic groups are present in Garhi Yasin. It is named after the Muslim Pathan founder Qazin, who still has a large presence in the town.

text: How the town got its name is not relevant.

refinement: It is second largest town of the district Shikarpur, with a population of 14,000. Many different ethnic groups are present in Garhi Yasin.

text: The common language should be mentioned.

refinement: It is second largest town of the district Shikarpur, with a population of 14,000. Many different ethnic groups are present in Garhi Yasin. Sindhi is the common language spoken by people in the region.

answer: It is second largest town of the district Shikarpur, with a population of 14,000. Many different ethnic groups are present in Garhi Yasin. Garhi Yasin is a Sindhi town and Sindhi is the common language of its people.

answer: Its population is about 14,000 and is the second largest city in the Sharakpur District in Sindh, Pakistan. The common language is Sindhi. The major religions of the area include Sindhi Hindu, Sindhi Muslims, and many other Muslims. Islam is the strongest religion in the area, but there are also some Christians, including Christians of the Sikhs in the area.

text: The line about Muslims is unattested; the text simply mentions clans migrating there.

refinement: Its population is about 14,000 and is the second largest city in the Sharakpur District in Sindh, Pakistan. The common language is Sindhi. After the region gained independence from British India, many Hindu and Sikh clans migrated to India. Islam is the strongest religion in the area, but there are also some Christians, including Christians of the Sikhs in the area.

text: The line about Islam and Christianity is unattested.

refinement: Its population is about 14,000 and is the second largest city in the Sharakpur District in Sindh, Pakistan. The common language is Sindhi. After the region gained independence from British India, many Hindu and Sikh clans migrated to India.

answer: The town has a population of more than 14,000. Garhi Yasin is one of the wealthiest towns in the area. The town is named after its founder Yasin Khan Pathan. Sindhi is the common language of the people in this region. The town has a Higher Secondary School, three high schools, several primary schools, a Mono Technique School, and a vocational School for typing, commercial, computer etc. A considerable part of the area is irrigated. Major productions of the area are rice, wheat, and pulses. The land is chiefly alluvial plain. The climate is very hot.

text: Details about education, irrigation, production, and climate are not relevant.

refinement: The town has a population of more than 14,000. Garhi Yasin is one of the wealthiest towns in the area. The town is named after its founder Yasin Khan Pathan. Sindhi is the common language of the people in this region.

answer: The town is the second largest town in the district of Shikarpur. It has a population of over 14,000. The town has a considerable part of the area that is irrigated. The town has a Higher Secondary School Agha Badaruddin Khan Durrani and three high schools. The town has a small market and manufactures of handicrafts, metal ware, furniture, bricks, and pottery. The hand-loom weaving of the area used to be very popular. Many Hindu and Sikh clans migrated to India.

answer: The town is the second largest town in the district of Shikarpur. It has a population of over 14,000. The town has a considerable part of the area that is irrigated. The town has a Higher Secondary School Agha Badaruddin Khan Durrani and three high schools. The town has a small market and manufactures of handicrafts, metal ware, furniture, bricks, and pottery. The hand-loom weaving of the area used to be very popular.

answer: The town has a population of more than 14,000. Garhi Yasin is one of the wealthiest towns in the area. The town is named after its founder Yasin Khan Pathan. Sindhi is the common language of the people in this region. The town has a Higher Secondary School, three high schools, several primary schools, a Mono Technique School, and a vocational School for typing, commercial, computer etc. A considerable part of the area is irrigated. Major productions of the area are rice, wheat, and pulses.

answer: Its population is about 14,000 and is the second largest city in the Garhi Yasin District in Sindh, Pakistan. The common language is Sindhi. The major religions of the area include Sindhi Hindu, Sindhi Muslims, and many other Muslims. Islam is the strongest religion in the area, but there are also some Christians, including Christians of the Sikhs in the area.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about the zoning laws in Garhi Yasin?

answer: The article does not discuss zoning laws in Garhi Yasin.

text: Should simply say "No answer" in that case

answer: No answer

answer: Nothing specific, but the town is divided into specific sections. There are two main towns and a number of villages.

text: The article doesn't discuss this.

answer: No answer

answer: No answer


text:
Always for You
Matt Dempsey

3 A.M. on a Saturday Morning
She finishes babysitting an adorable six month old baby. She knew she was in for a long night, but this is a little later than she expected. She's not worried though. She's not worried about a thing at this moment. She's feeling relaxed, carefree, and most importantly, ignorant of every aspect of life around her. She plans on staying the night at her friend's apartment that isn't too far away. It's at least closer than her folks' house, where she moved back last summer. She needs to make one stop before settling in at her friend's.

3:30 A.M.
Jesus Christ! Did she forget what she was doing? She's behind the wheel of her parents' SUV, cruising at 40 MPH down the city streets. How has she not been paying attention to where she's going? Next thing she knows, her tires are scraping the curb and POP! There goes the front tire. POP! There goes the back one as well. She slams on the brakes before running into the street lamp post mere feet in front of her car. Holy shit, she thinks. She is beginning to freak out. What the fuck did I just do? Make a call. I don't know what to do now.

3:45 A.M.
Her friend doesn't answer her frantic phone calls. She must have fallen asleep waiting for her to come. Shit, what the hell do I do now? She thinks. Relax; don't make a big deal out of this. It'll be okay, I'll figure this out. Oh no, what is that now? Is that a police car pulling up? Fuck.

4:00 A.M.
She's in the backseat of a city patrol cruiser. The officer who came to check her situation has not been fooled. He knows there is something more going on here than a sleepy girl who just got done with some late night babysitting. For one, this girl is slurring her words. Not too much, she doesn't sound drunk. And the breathalyzer came back as zero. For another, she doesn't seem all too upset by this. He'd have expected her to be in tears, begging to be let go by now. But she's surprisingly calm in the cruiser, with her hands cuffed behind her back. He'll take her to the closest station a mile or so away and go from there.

5:00 A.M.
Her mother's phone rings. This certainly is not a sales call. No one is going to try selling her insurance at this time of hour. She has that motherly instinct snap into her head, the kind that develops after raising two children, one to the age of having her own husband and son. Something isn't right. Hello? She sounds worried. Mom, I'm in trouble, she hears in the phone earpiece. What's going on? She asks. Oh my god, are you okay? She hears an officer in the background say she's not supposed to be on the phone right now. Put him on the phone! Let me talk to him. What's going on, officer? DUI? What? Oh my god. Where is she? When will I hear from her again?

7:00 A.M.
He wakes up to his cell phone ringing next to him in his bed. His phone plays that one song he really liked a few years ago, but is tired of now that he hears it every time someone calls. He's only gone to bed a few hours ago and has his own thought that something must be wrong. For some reason he turned his phone's ringer volume on high before going to bed. Just had a feeling he should. Hello? The first thing said to him is Has she been doing drugs? Her sister's voice is scared, worried, angry, sad. All these things mixed together, shaken, not stirred. What happened? He asks. She wrecked the car and got arrested for a DUI. Holy shit. Gimme a minute here, I'm just waking up.

1:00 P.M.
He sits across from her mother in a cafe nearby. Neither has ordered food and really doesn't intend to. Their hungers are nonexistent, harder to find than a hot new gadget at Christmas time. Feels like they will never eat again. Her mother asks him question after question. He feels he can't lie to this woman. He has come to love and respect her, and sees how much she is hurting. If he can't help her, maybe her mother can. But she must know at least as much as he does at this point, which isn't a whole lot. But much more than she or any other family member knows. She was on her way to buy more, her mother explains, so the police did not find anything in the car. A possession charge would make this far worse, he responds. They stay at the cafe for two hours. He has ordered her a coffee and gotten a Mountain Dew for himself. The caffeine will be helpful to them both. It has been a long day so far, and neither has gotten decent rest in the last twelve hours or so. Finally, they get into his car and he drives her home. It won't be another hour until her daughter arrives home with her husband, who has bailed her out of jail and paid a hefty fine to recover their busted up SUV.

8:00 P.M
She has been sleeping most of the day. Her morning in the clink combined with the reason she was there has worn her out. Sleep is the only thing she needs right now, so everyone lets her rest. He sits at her sister's house. He has driven an hour to get here but it's better than sitting at home alone, with his thoughts racing around his head like racers in the INDY 500. Over and over, around and around. He couldn't stand it so he made the drive. They have been talking for a couple hours now. He tells her more than maybe he should, but he has carried this burden of knowing such things for so long. And he needs help with holding the weight.

8:30 P.M.
She finally wakes up and starts talking to her mother. She says she was just sleepy, doesn't know why she would be charged with a DUI. That's just silly, the breathalyzer read zero. Her mother knows why, and she knows a great deal more at this point. But she's slowly working her way into explaining how she's come by such information. She calls her sister. She asks if there is a visitor at her sister's house. Yes, there is. She says. He did what he thought was the right thing to do. He cares about you. He was trying to help. No, of course not. Yes, I think it was the right thing to do. We needed to know so we can try to help you. Okay, I'll tell him. Her sister hangs up the phone. She tells him she would like for him to go home now. She has promised her sister she would ask him to leave and right now, it doesn't seem like a good idea to fuck with her. Okay, well thank you for coming over and for everything you've done. Gimme a hug. Goodnight.

6:00 P.M. Sunday Evening
He sends a text message to her sister. How is she doing today? He doesn't receive an answer for two hours. It's she who answers, not her sister. You know I'm alive and fine. Please don't contact my sister anymore. She is absolutely livid at him for what he's told her family. She feels he has snitched on her. That he had some kind of ulterior motives, bad intentions. Just wanted to make her look bad and turn her family against her friends. She doesn't want to speak to him ever again. If he cares about her, please, never speak to her again. Just last week they were not speaking, they were going their separate ways. But he was brought back into her life by that phone call early yesterday morning. Just like that. If he couldn't do anything to help her, he thought her family should know so they could. He was the only one who knew any of the things he told them. She would have gone on lying to them if he hadn't done what he thought was right. Next time she will wind up dead, or in jail, possibly for hurting or killing someone else. These are things that she has not yet thought about; she has much bigger things to worry about at the moment. Defending herself in court, for instance. He does not push the subject and the conversation ends.

title: Always for You

question: Who is the narrator?

answer: The narrator is the girl's boyfriend.

text: The narration is from a 3rd person perspective and we see through the eyes of each of the characters mentioned in the story at one time or an other. It is never stated that he is her boyfriend.

refinement: The narration is from a 3rd person perspective and the focus switches to the different characters mentioned in the story.

text: The narration remains in the 3rd person, and switches perspectives from each of the characters throughout. The male friend's perspective is a heavy focus.

text: No answer.

refinement: The narration is from a 3rd person perspective and the focus switches to the different characters mentioned in the story.

answer: The narrator isn't a character in the story.

answer: The narrator is the girl who wrecked her parents' car and was arrested for a DUI.

text: Incorrect

refinement: The narration is from a 3rd person perspective and the focus switches to the different characters mentioned in the story.

text: The narration remains in the 3rd person, and switches perspectives from each of the characters throughout. The girl's perspective is a heavy focus.

question: Summarize the 7:00 A.M. section.

answer: The main character's mother receives a phone call from her daughter's friend, informing her that her daughter was arrested for a DUI. The friend who called explains that the main character was on her way to buy drugs when she wrecked her parents' car. The main character's mother is understandably upset and asks the friend who called to come over and explain everything to her. The friend meets with the main character's mother and sister and explains what happened. The main character's sister is angry with the friend for telling her family and tells him to never contact her again.

text: This is a summary of the story. This is not a summary of the 7:00 A.M. section, which is a small part of the whole story.

refinement: The boyfriend wakes up to a call from his girlfriend's sister. He asks what happened and she explains she has been arrested for a DUI.

answer: The protagonist's mother is awoken by a phone call from her daughter's friend. Her daughter has been arrested for a DUI and is in jail. The protagonist's mother is worried and asks the officer what happened. The officer tells her that her daughter was driving her parents' SUV and crashed it into a street lamp. The protagonist's mother is worried and asks the officer to put her daughter on the phone. The officer tells her that her daughter is not allowed to talk on the phone. The protagonist's mother asks the officer what happened and he tells her that her daughter was driving her parents' SUV and crashed it into a street lamp.

text: This is a summary of the story. This is not a summary of the 7:00 A.M. section, which is a small part of the whole story.

refinement: The boyfriend wakes up to a call from his girlfriend's sister. He asks what happened and she explains she has been arrested for a DUI.

answer: The narrator wakes up to his phone ringing next to him in his bed. His phone plays that one song he really liked a few years ago, but is tired of now that he hears it every time someone calls. He's only gone to bed a few hours ago and has his own thought that something must be wrong. For some reason he turned his phone's ringer volume on high before going to bed. Just had a feeling he should. Hello? The first thing said to him is Has she been doing drugs? Her sister's voice is scared, worried, angry, sad. All these things mixed together, shaken, not stirred. What happened? He asks. She wrecked the car and got arrested for a DUI. Holy shit. Gimme a minute here, I'm just waking up.

text: This is not a summary of the moment, it is a copy of te moment from the original text.

refinement: The boyfriend wakes up to a call from his girlfriend's sister. He asks what happened and she explains she has been arrested for a DUI.

answer: A man, presumably a boyfriend or friend of the woman, wakes up to a call from the woman's sister telling him of the woman's DUI. He tells her he's just waking up and to give him a minute before he can answer her questions.

question: Why was the girl in the backseat of a city patrol cruiser?

answer: She was arrested for a DUI.

answer: The girl was arrested for driving under the influence.

answer: The girl was arrested for a DUI.

answer: She was arrested for seemingly driving under the influence.

question: Is there mention of a cafe at 1:00 P.M. or 8:30 P.M.?

answer: 1:00 P.M.

answer: There is mention of a cafe at 1:00 P.M.

answer: There is no mention of a cafe at 1:00 P.M. but there is at 8:30 P.M.

text: The answer is entirely incorrect. The cafe is definitely mentioned at 1pm and not at 8.30pm as stated.

answer: No

text: Incorrect. The cafe is mentioned at 1:00 P.M.

question: What type of drinks are consumed in this story?

answer: Coffee and Mountain Dew

answer: Coffee and Mountain Dew are consumed in this story.

answer: Coffee and Mountain Dew

answer: Coffee and Mountain Dew

question: Why is her sister's voice scared?

answer: Her sister's voice is scared because her daughter has been arrested for a DUI.

text: The answer is referring to the woman's sister, not her mother, so there should be no reference to 'her daughter'

refinement: She is worried about her sister who was arrested for a DUI.

answer: She is worried about her sister.

answer: Her sister is scared because her daughter has been arrested for a DUI.

text: The answer is referring to the woman's sister, not her mother, so there should be no reference to 'her daughter'

refinement: She is worried about her sister who was arrested for a DUI.

answer: The woman's sister is telling the man (presumably her ex-boyfriend) that the woman has been charged with a DUI. She was clearly worried for her sister.

text: Confusing answer. It can be simplified by removing the first sentence.

text: Tense should be changed from 'was' to 'is' in keeping with the question.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: The protagonist has been arrested for a DUI and her family is struggling to understand what happened. The protagonist's friend tries to help her by telling her family what happened, but the protagonist tells him to stop contacting her.

answer: This story details the fallout from a woman's 4:00 A.M. arrest for a DUI despite passing a breathalyzer. In the first two hours after her DUI, her mother, sister, father, and presumably a male friend or boyfriend learn what happened. The male friend meets up with the woman's mother to confess that he knows that the woman has been doing drugs. The friend just wanted to help her by sharing this secret with her family, but this results in the woman ordering him out of her life for betraying her.

text: It is unnecessary to surmise that he is 'possibly a male friend or boyfriend'. Better to keep it simple and just say 'male friend'.

refinement: This story details the fallout from a woman's 4:00 A.M. arrest for a DUI despite passing a breathalyzer. In the first two hours after her DUI, her mother, sister, father, and a male friend learn what happened. The male friend meets up with the woman's mother to confess that he knows that the woman has been doing drugs. The friend just wanted to help her by sharing this secret with her family, but this results in the woman ordering him out of her life for betraying her.

text: The list of family members can be simplified o just 'her family'

refinement: This story details the fallout from a woman's 4:00 A.M. arrest for a DUI despite passing a breathalyzer. In the first two hours after her DUI, her family and a male friend learn what happened. The male friend meets up with the woman's mother to confess that he knows that the woman has been doing drugs. The friend just wanted to help her by sharing this secret with her family, but this results in the woman ordering him out of her life for betraying her.

answer: A woman is driving her parents' SUV when she gets into an accident. She is arrested for a DUI. Her mother and her boyfriend are worried about her. The woman is released from jail and her boyfriend tells her family about her addiction. The woman is angry at him for telling her family.

text: It is never stated that he is her boyfriend, though it can be inferred, it would be better to call him her friend for clarity.

refinement: A woman is driving her parents' SUV when she gets into an accident. She is arrested for a DUI. Her mother and her friend are worried about her. The woman is released from jail and her friend tells her family about her addiction. The woman is angry at him for telling her family.

text: An over-all edit for further clarity is necessary.

refinement: A woman is driving her parents' SUV when she gets into an accident. She is arrested for a DUI. Her mother and her friend are worried about her. The woman is released from jail and the friend tells the woman's family about her addiction. The woman is angry at him for telling and says she never wants to speak to him again.

answer: A young woman is arrested for a DUI and her mother is worried about her. The young woman's friend is not home when she calls and she is arrested for a DUI. The young woman's mother is worried about her and her friend tells her mother about the young woman's friend's DUI. The young woman's friend tells her that he was trying to help her and that he cares about her. The young woman's friend tells her that he will not contact her again.

text: Over-all grammatical edit required for clarity and removal of repetitions such as 'the young woman's mother is worried about her'

refinement: A young woman is arrested for a DUI and her mother is worried about her. Her mother and her friend meet, and he reveals what he knows about her situation with drugs. Later the young woman's friend tells her that he was trying to help her and that he cares about her but she refuses to ever speak to him again.


text:
Last Stop

Sweat begins to drip down Reznov’s face as the countryside of his homeland rushes by his window. He knows what’s coming up and it’s a necessity that he maintains his composure yet his heart starts to palpitate and palms become clammy as the border crossing gets closer and closer. He’s confused and taken back by his anxious state. He’s forgotten the first rule in his line of work; maintain a calm state of mind and under no circumstances …break… character. This directly leads into rule number two; don’t, get, caught. Then again this time it isn’t really work. He’s not pretending anymore, not adopting a new character when he arrives at his destination nor are there any contacts to help…this time it’s just him. This time it’s personal. No more fake IDs and passports and most importantly no more help from Shinra Headquarters.

Shinra Headquarters. He shudders at the thought of his old place of work. What he believed in, what he worked for, what he fought for, what he lived for, and yet, the whole reason why he’s fleeing. He thinks back on what caused him to turn his back on his homeland, never to return, to effectively run from his country and kin and seek refuge in ‘enemy’ territory. All of his life he thought he was fighting for the right reasons. He’s seen so much now that he doesn’t know what to think. Was everything he believed in and dedicated his life for a lie? All propaganda from a totalitarian and fascist government that he himself worked for and gathered intel for and worst still…believed in. It’s like his whole world has been tipped upside down since he broke free from that world of despair and oppressive tyranny. He still can’t believe that he couldn’t see what kind of world he was living in worse yet working for. Not until now.  Peace sells…but who’s buying? They tried to control everything, control people to the point of oppression, control food, control luxury items, control thought, control free speech. Control freedom. It’s like the harder you squeeze your fist the more easily people will see cracks between your fingers like he did. He finally realised that the people and government he was working for and had once believed in was incompatible with his morals.

As he thinks this he is disrupted by the chime of a the train announcement; “Last stop coming up; The International border crossing at Safia” .

His stomach drops and he feels as though he’s just gone over the crest of a steep rollercoaster experiencing negative gravity. He turns pale, shudders as if someone had poured ice cold water down his back. Then Reznov feels unbearably ill. He takes several deep breaths trying to keep calm and collected. He reflects on  past missions he has completed - hundreds of dangerous and risky operations, with many involving tricky border crossings, even been in life threatening situations several times and he’s done this all without batting an eyelid. Yet now that has been backed into fleeing and he is a mess. He’s meant to be a professional yet right now he’s acting like an amateur, with nerves worse than the first day on the job. Not calm or confident in his expert ability. He’s mouth feels full of cotton wool and his throat dry.

Suddenly he hears foot steps behind him. This is it he thinks. It’s over. Well I’m not going out without a fight he mutters as he mentally prepares himself. The footsteps get closer. His fight or flight response kicks in and there’s an adrenalin surge throughout his body. He has the look of a prepared killer in is mako green eyes and he is ready. He feels a hand on his shoulder.

“Excuse me, sir...”

He grabs the hand and pins the person against the wall of the train violently. To his horror he sees a petrified young female train attendant. What has he done how could he do this he thinks.

“S..sorry” Reznov stutters then he runs to the restroom.

He slams closed the door, puts his hands against the sink and looks at himself in the mirror dripping in sweat still feeling unbearably ill.

He was ready to kill that poor young train attendant without so much as a second thought, thank god he didn’t he thinks. He splashes water on his face as deeply exhales; he doesn’t know what to do now. He’s questioning his ability, wondering if it’s worth it, wondering if he’ll even make it. He’s lost.

“This is your driver speaking, we are 5 minutes away from the international border crossing have your RFID chips and registration ready, thank you for traveling skyline railway have a safe trip”

He can’t do this he thinks. He looks in his front pocket at his last resort. The last line of defence for any Shinra covert agent. Cyanide. He takes out his forged registration and looks at where the RFID chip he made and programed was in his arm. In his right hand is his registration. In his left hand is a cyanide pill. Possible freedom. Or instant escape. He hears the train screech on the breaks as they arrive at their last stop. It’s time to decide…

title: Last Stop (Short story I wrote for school feedback is appreciated)

question: Where is the story set?

answer: The story is set on a train.

text: It is on a train but more information would improve the answer

refinement: The story is set on a train at the international border of Reznov's homeland and enemy territory.

answer: The story is set at the international border crossing between the protagonist's homeland and "enemy" territory.

text: Could include the information about the train

refinement: The story is set on a train at the international border crossing between the protagonist's homeland and "enemy" territory.

answer: Aboard a train in a fictional totalitarian state

answer: The story is set in the countryside of Reznov's homeland.

text: Insuficient information and a little misguiding

refinement: The story is set on a train at the international border of Reznov's homeland and enemy territory.

question: Who is the main character?

answer: The main character is Reznov, a former Shinra agent who is fleeing his homeland.

answer: Reznov, a former Shinra agent

answer: The main character is Reznov.

answer: Reznov

question: What decision must the main character make at the end?

answer: Whether he will try to escape with his forged documents or take a cyanide pill

text: In his right hand is his registration. In his left hand is a cyanide pill. Possible freedom. Or instant escape.

answer: The main character must decide whether to stay on the train and risk being caught or to take the cyanide pill and escape.

text: The answer is a little misleading as the escape offered by the cyanide pill is death.

refinement: The main character must decide whether to stay on the train and risk being caught or to take the cyanide pill and escape.

text: In his right hand is his registration. In his left hand is a cyanide pill. Possible freedom. Or instant escape.

answer: The main character must decide whether to use the cyanide pill or to use the RFID chip.

text: In his right hand is his registration. In his left hand is a cyanide pill. Possible freedom. Or instant escape.

answer: He must decide whether to take the cyanide pill or not.

text: In his right hand is his registration. In his left hand is a cyanide pill. Possible freedom. Or instant escape.

question: Why is the main character fleeing his country?

answer: He believes that the totalitarian and fascist government he lives under is incompatible with his morals

text: He finally realised that the people and government he was working for and had once believed in was incompatible with his morals.

answer: He has turned his back on his homeland, never to return, to effectively run from his country and kin and seek refuge in 'enemy' territory.

text: This doesn't answer the question

refinement: The main character is fleeing his country because he has realized that the government he was working for and had once believed in was incompatible with his morals.

answer: The main character is fleeing his country because he has come to realize that the government and people he was working for are oppressive and incompatible with his morals. He is now questioning his ability and wondering if he will make it out alive.

text: The last sentence is superfluous and doesn't answer the question

refinement: The main character is fleeing his country because he has come to realize that the government and people he was working for are oppressive and incompatible with his morals.

text: He finally realised that the people and government he was working for and had once believed in was incompatible with his morals.

answer: The main character is fleeing his country because he has realized that the government he was working for and had once believed in was incompatible with his morals.

text: He finally realised that the people and government he was working for and had once believed in was incompatible with his morals.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: Reznov is on the run from his homeland, having turned his back on his old life and the government he once believed in. He is conflicted and unsure of what to do, but knows that he must cross the border into enemy territory. As the train arrives at the border crossing, Reznov is faced with a difficult decision: to risk everything and cross the border, or to take the easy way out and commit suicide.

answer: Reznov is aboard a train heading to the border of his country. He is a former secret agent for Shinra, his country's intelligence organization, but he feels his morals are at odds with his country's totalitarian and fascist government. As the train nears the border, he starts to panic and nearly attacks a train attendant. He goes to the bathroom and contemplates whether to try to escape with his forged documents or take a cyanide pill.

answer: Reznov is a Shinra covert agent who is fleeing his homeland. He is on a train to the border crossing at Safia. He is thinking about his past missions and how he is a mess. He is about to cross the border when he hears footsteps behind him.

text: The summary leaves out some important facts

refinement: Reznov is a Shinra covert agent who is fleeing his homeland. He is on a train to the border crossing at Safia, enemy territory. In his nervous state he attacks a train attendant. He faces grave danger and must make the choice on whether to cross or take a cyanide pill.

answer: Reznov is a former Shinra agent who has been on the run for years. He is about to cross the border into enemy territory, and he is not sure if he can do it. He is conflicted about his decision to leave his homeland and his family, and he is not sure if he can do it.

text: This is a poor summary

refinement: Reznov is aboard a train heading to the border of his country. He is a former secret agent for Shinra, his country's intelligence organization, but he feels his morals are at odds with his country's totalitarian and fascist government. As the train nears the border, he starts to panic and nearly attacks a train attendant. He goes to the bathroom and contemplates whether to try to escape with his forged documents or take a cyanide pill.


text:
There was once a little boy who lived with his grandpa because his mom and dad had gone away for a very long time. They did a very bad thing to the boy. The little boy loved his grandpa very much but he didn't know it. Grandpa knew the little boy loved him very much and he loved him back, even more than he loved himself. The little boy's favorite food was macaroni and cheese. His grandpa was very good at making macaroni and cheese and he made it every night and the boy was happy. He went to school and learned about big animals that live very far away and he loved to read. He read mystery books and funny books and comic books. He loved Superman.

It was his birthday and grandpa was making him macaroni and cheese with tuna and peas, that was his favorite dinner. He put a pan of water onto the stove and the peas in the microwave. Grandpa bought the boy a new issue of Superman that the boy wanted very badly. The boy would always take the bus home because his grandpa didn't have a car. So the grandpa put the boys favorite movie into the DVD player and waited for the boy.

The water started to bubble and boil over so grandpa turned the oven down and poured the macaroni in. The microwave beeped so grandpa turned it off and let the peas cool down. He drained the macaroni and stirred the cheese and mixed in the tuna and peas. The bowl was very hot so grandpa put a paper towel underneath it. He didn't want the boy to burn himself. The TV asked grandpa if he wanted to play the movie but he didn't want to because the boy was not home.

Grandpa waited and waited for the little boy and the macaroni and cheese with tuna and peas wasn't hot anymore. He started to watch the movie and became very sad. Grandpa was very worried about the boy and so he got his cane and coat and walked out into the cold. He walked until he got to the boy's bus stop and it was very dark now. He did not see the boy at the bus stop and there were no cars on the road. He sat down on the bench and started to shiver and breathe faster than he should have. More snow started to fall and now grandpa almost couldn't see anything at all. The boy was not around. Grandpa couldn't cry because it was too cold. But he wanted to and he sobbed for a very long time.

The boy's head hurt and he was very cold but he finally got home after a long walk. He had to take a different way because the other mean boys told him he couldn't take the bus anymore. The boy picked up the front door key and opened the door. The house was very dark like it was outside and so he turned on the light. He saw his favorite food on the table, macaroni and cheese with tuna and peas. There was a comic book on the table and his favorite was on the TV and the funny animals were there talking to each other and the boy sat and watched and called for grandpa. But grandpa was not there and the boy could not find him. He looked in the bathroom and the kitchen and his room and grandpas room but he was not there.

He was hungry so he ate the macaroni and cheese with tuna and peas. He looked at the comic book and it was the new issue of Superman that the boy wanted so badly and so he read it. Grandpa wrote on the inside of how much he loved the boy and he hoped he enjoyed the comic book. The macaroni and cheese with tuna and peas was cold but it was still very good. Grandpa loved cooking for the little boy and the little loved grandpa's cooking because it made him feel comfortable and warm and he loved grandpa very much but he didn't know it.

Grandpa had dropped his cane and he was feeling very cold and tired so he fell asleep. He thought about the boy and how he loved the boy very much, even more than he loved himself. And he fell asleep. A man came by and asked grandpa if he was okay but grandpa didn't answer.

The boy waited and waited for grandpa and he fell asleep on the table and he heard the funny animals talking to each other and it made him feel good. Grandpa tucked him into bed and covered him up in warm blankets and he told the boy he loved him very much and he would make him macaroni and cheese tomorrow.

title: I'd be grateful if anyone took a look at my short story The Little Boy and His Grandpa

question: Describe the relationship between the little boy and grandpa.

answer: The little boy and his grandpa have a very close and loving relationship. The little boy loves his grandpa very much, even though he may not know it, and the grandpa loves the little boy even more than he loves himself. They enjoy spending time together, cooking and eating meals together, and watching movies together. Grandpa goes out into the cold to find the boy when he is missing, and is very worried when he cannot find him.

answer: The little boy loves his grandpa very much and the grandpa loves him back. The little boy's favorite food is macaroni and cheese.

text: I don't think the mac and cheese needs to be mentioned unless it is specifically situated within the love between the boy and his grandpa.

refinement: The little boy loves his grandpa very much and the grandpa loves him back.

answer: The relationship between the little boy and grandpa is one of love and care.

answer: The two seem to have a very loving relationship. The boy doesn't know how much he loves his Grandpa.

text: The little boy loved his grandpa very much but he didn't know it.

question: What is the main event of the story?

answer: The main event of the story is when the boy doesn't come home so Grandpa goes to look for him. The boy then comes back to a home without Grandpa.

answer: The boy's birthday.

text: This needs more detail to explain why the story would center on it.

refinement: On the boy's birthday, he's late coming home because he has to take the long route due to bullies' not letting him on the bus. Grandpa has made his favorite meal for him, but since the boy has yet to show up, he goes looking for the boy. While Grandpa is gone, the boy returns, and is sad that Grandpa isn't there.

answer: The main event of the story is the boy's birthday.

text: There needs to be more detail.

refinement: On the boy's birthday, he's late coming home because he has to take the long route due to bullies' not letting him on the bus. Grandpa has made his favorite meal for him, but since the boy has yet to show up, he goes looking for the boy. While Grandpa is gone, the boy returns, and is sad that Grandpa isn't there.

answer: The main event of the story is the little boy's worry and concern for his grandpa after he does not return home from going to meet the boy at the bus stop. The boy eventually finds his grandpa asleep in the house, and is relieved to find him safe.

question: Why does the boy's head hurt?

answer: The boy's head hurts because he has a headache.

answer: It's not clear, but it may be implied his head hurts due to his long walk.

answer: He was beaten up by the other boys.

answer: The boy's head hurts because he walked a long way home in the cold.

question: Where does this story take place?

answer: That information can't be found

text: This mostly takes place at Grandpa's house, and the areas surrounding it.

refinement: It can be deduced that this takes place at Grandpa's house, and the areas surrounding it where both the boy and Grandpa walk at different times.

answer: The story seems to take place at Grandpa's house in a nondescript town.

answer: The story takes place in a small town in the United States.

text: It largely takes place at Grandpa's house, as well.

refinement: The story takes place in a small town in the United States, and a setting that features prominently in the story is Grandpa's house.

answer: The story takes place in a small town or city.

text: It also takes place at Grandpa's house.

refinement: The story takes place in a small town, and a setting that features prominently in the story is Grandpa's house.

question: What is the tone of this story?

answer: The tone is sad.

text: I think it's also heartwarming, given the love the two have for each other.

answer: The tone of this story is bittersweet. The little boy loves his grandpa dearly, but the grandpa is unable to find the boy when he goes out looking for him. The boy is happy to find his favorite food waiting for him, but is saddened by the absence of his grandpa.

answer: The tone of this story is supposed to be heartwarming.

text: I think it is equal parts sad and/or bittersweet-the ending indicates the Grandpa might have died and that's his ghost. Even a less drastic interpretation has Grandpa falling asleep out in the snow while the boy wonders where he is, also all alone.

refinement: The tone of this story is supposed to be heartwarming yet sad.

answer: The tone of this story is sad.

text: It's also heartwarming, given their love for each other.

refinement: The tone of this story is sad but heartwarming.

question: How does the story end?

answer: The boy falls asleep on the table and hears the funny animals talking to each other. Grandpa tucks him into bed and covers him up in warm blankets. He tells the boy he loves him very much and will make him macaroni and cheese tomorrow.

answer: The story ends with the little boy falling asleep on the table after waiting for his grandpa to return. The boy dreams of the funny animals on the TV and feels comforted by the thought of his grandpa cooking him his favorite meal of macaroni and cheese with tuna and peas the next day.

answer: The story ends with the boy falling asleep on the table and hearing the funny animals talking to each other.

text: This answer omits Grandpa's putting the boy to sleep.

refinement: The story ends with the boy falling asleep on the table and hearing the funny animals talking to each other. Grandpa puts him to bed and promises to make the macaroni and cheese tomorrow.

answer: The story ends with Grandpa returning home and tucking the boy into bed, promising to make macaroni and cheese in the morning.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: A little boy lives with his grandpa because his parents are away. He loves his grandpa very much, but doesn't know it. His grandpa loves him back, even more than he loves himself. The boy's favorite food is macaroni and cheese.

text: This does not summarize the action in the story.

refinement: A little boy lives with his grandpa-whom he loves very much-because his parents are away. On his birthday, the boy is late because he is taking the long way home due to some bullies. Grandpa has cooked him his favorite meal of macaroni and cheese, and goes to look for the boy, who returns to find Grandpa gone, so he falls asleep. Grandpa returns home and puts the boy to bed, promising to make his favorite meal again tomorrow.

answer: The story is about a little boy who lives with his grandpa because his parents have gone away for a very long time. The boy loves his grandpa very much but he doesn't know it. The boy's favorite food is macaroni and cheese. The boy goes to school and learns about big animals that live very far away and he loves to read. He reads mystery books and funny books and comic books. He loves Superman.

text: This has gratuitous points, not essential to the story.

refinement: The story is about a little boy who lives with his grandpa because his parents have gone away for a very long time. The boy loves his grandpa very much but he doesn't know it. The boy's favorite food is macaroni and cheese.

text: I added the actual events of the story.

refinement: The story is about a little boy who lives with his grandpa because his parents have gone away for a very long time. The boy's favorite food is macaroni and cheese, and Grandpa loves him so much he makes it for him on his birthday. The boy has to walk the long way home due to some bullies, so Grandpa goes to look for him, and is therefore gone when the boy gets home. Grandpa returns to find the boy asleep and puts him to bed, promising to make his favorite meal again tomorrow.

answer: This is a story about a little boy who loves his grandpa very much, but when the boy comes home from school one day, his grandpa is nowhere to be found. The boy finds a bowl of macaroni and cheese with tuna and peas on the table, and a comic book that his grandpa had bought him. The boy falls asleep, and when he wakes up, his grandpa is there, tucking him into bed and telling him he loves him.

text: I added that Grandpa is gone because he is out looking for the boy.

refinement: This is a story about a little boy who loves his grandpa very much, but when the boy comes home from school one day, his grandpa is nowhere to be found because he is out looking for the boy. The boy finds a bowl of macaroni and cheese with tuna and peas on the table, and a comic book that his grandpa had bought him. The boy falls asleep, and when he wakes up, his grandpa is there, tucking him into bed and telling him he loves him.

answer: A loving grandfather makes his grandson his favorite meal for his birthday, but the little boy doesn't come home after school. The grandfather goes out to look for him and can't find him anywhere. The boy returns home and can't find his grandfather. The grandfather eventually comes home and tucks the boy in bed and promises to make him macaroni and cheese the next day.