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SINE KASSIM CHADI (b. February 13, 1956) is businessman, philanthropist and former politician. He is currently CEO and Chairman of Imperial Equities Inc. a publicly traded company on the TSX Venture Exchange[1]. Chadi has been the CEO of companies involved in real estate and mortgage industries[2]. Chadi was also elected to the Alberta Legislature in 1993 as the MLA for Edmonton Roper. He served one term[3].

Political career

From 1993 to 1997, Chadi was a Member of the Legislative Assembly (MLA), elected as the Liberal candidate in Edmonton Roper during the 1993 Provincial Election. The election saw the Alberta Liberal Party under Laurence Decore lose narrowly to Ralph Klein’s Conservatives in what was, to that point, the closest election in Alberta history. He defeated incumbent New Democrat MLA Christie Mjolness to win his seat[4]. Chadi served as a Deputy Finance critic as well as critic for Economic Development and Trade and Science and Research, and Treasury,[5]. He also served as a member of the Public Accounts Committee, as well as on the Committees on the Alberta Heritage Savings Fund Act,the Select Standing Committee on law and Regulations and the Select Standing Committee on Public Affairs[6]

In 1994, he ran for Leader of the Alberta Liberal Party[7]. It was a controversial and divisive leadership process, which was ultimately won by Grant Mitchell.[8] Chadi completed his term as MLA, and did not to run for a second term in the Legislature.[9]

Early life

The Chadi Family was among Canada’s first Lebanese settlers, first travelling into the Lac La Biche area in 1895, where they participated in the fur trade, set up a general store and provided some of the most significant regional competition to the Hudson’s Bay Company [24]. Sine’s father Mike (Mahmoud) and his wife Zeher had six children, of which Sine was the third. Zeher Chadi passed away from breast cancer at the young age of 34 in 1967. Mike Chadi expanded his business focus to the Fort Chipwyan area and opened a general store in that area in 1972 while Sine Chadi and his siblings looked after the local businesses in the Lac La Biche area [25]. Sine graduated from High School in Lac La Biche in 1973 [26]

Business career

Sine’s earliest business activities were within his family businesses, from buying and trading furs to working in the livestock industry[10]. Sine’s business interests began to expand into the construction and management of retail fuel service centres, a mortgage business and an insurance agency as well as a real estate business[11] In 1987, he moved his business operations to Edmonton, where he continues to be based[12]. In 1998, Sine founded Imperial Equities[13].[14]. The company has grown over 20 years to the point where is has approximately 1 million square feet of leasable space[15]. Imperial assets are valued at more than $220 million (2019 financial).[16].

Charitable work, community leadership, and fundraising

Chadi has supported many community groups and charities. He is known for his rousing auctioneering activities and for his generosity[17] His has also offered business and promotion counsel to many causes[18].

Chadi is an active participant in the fundraising activities of many organizations. He was fundraising chair of a $7 million campaign for the Glenrose Rehabilitation Hospital Foundation[19], where he also served as a Board Member for many years. The Chadi Family Foundation, made the lead donation to the Glenrose’s Capital Campaign in 2018, committing $1 million[20].

Chadi has also been a lead organizer for E4C, an organization focused on anti-poverty initiatives and operator of Edmonton City Hall’s Hallway Café which provides job and life skills support to vulnerable youth[21]. He was also the organizer of the Premier’s Wild Game Dinner which raised money for multiple causes[22].

Chadi also currently serves a Director of the Parkinson Association of Alberta[23], and of the Gordon and Diane Buchanan Family Foundation[24], which has spearheaded the construction and operation of the $6 million Buchanan Centre[25] as a wellness centre for people suffering from Parkinson disease. He has also served on the Board of the Capital Care Foundation and continues to financially support the organization[26]. He was also finance chair for the $23 million Edmonton Islamic Academy[27]

[1] http://www.leb411.com/images/Sine_Chadi.pdf

[2] https://www.bloomberg.com/profile/person/2129337

[3] http://www.assembly.ab.ca/net/index.aspx?p=memberprofile&mid=0657

[4] 1993 Alberta general election

[5] http://www.assembly.ab.ca/net/index.aspx?p=memberprofile&mid=0657

[6] http://www.assembly.ab.ca/net/index.aspx?p=memberprofile&mid=0657.

[7] Edmonton Journal (1994) Chadi jumps into Liberal race, p. 6

[8] Stewart, D.K. and Archer, K. (2000) Quasi-Democracy?: Parties and Leadership Selection in Alberta, pp. 71-74.

[9] Edmonton Journal (1996) Retiring Liberal MLAs bounced as critics, page 8

[10] http://www.leb411.com/images/Sine_Chadi.pdf

[11] http://www.leb411.com/images/Sine_Chadi.pdf

[12] http://www.leb411.com/images/Sine_Chadi.pdf

[13] https://imperialequities.com/about-the-company/

[14] Edmontonians, (2005) Sine of the Times, pages 5-6

[15] https://imperialequities.com/portfolio/

[16] Imperial Equities (2020) Growing in a Changing World, 2019 Annual Report, Audited Financial Statements (Grant Thornton) p. 78

[17] https://e4calberta.org/2019/04/i-like-the-idea-of-something-different/

[18] Edmonton Journal (2003) Arctic ice fishing trip with Klein no sweat for local parka-maker, p. 19

[19] glenrosefoundation.com

[20] https://edmontonjournal.com/opinion/columnists/glenrose-rehabilitation-hospital-foundation-receives-surprise-1-million-donation/

[21] https://e4calberta.org/2019/04/i-like-the-idea-of-something-different/

[22] Edmonton Journal (2003) Arctic ice fishing trip with Klein no sweat for local parka-maker, p. 19

[23] http://parkinsonassociation.ca/board-of-directors

[24] https://www.gdbuchananfoundation.org/board

[25] http://parkinsonassociation.ca/the-buchanan-centre-2

[26] https://www.capitalcarefoundation.net/116.asp

[27] https://iqna.ir/en/news/1502902/new-islamic-school-open-in-edmonton-

title: Sine Chadi

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize everything relating to Chadi's family.

answer: Sine Chadi's parents are Mike and Zehere.

text: The answer could mention his siblings.

refinement: Sine Chadi's parents are Mike and Zehere. Sine was the third of six children.

text: The answer could mention what became of Zehere.

refinement: Sine Chadi's parents are Mike and Zehere. Sine was the third of six children. Zehere passed away from breast cancer in 1967.

text: The answer could mention the family business.

refinement: Sine Chadi's parents are Mike and Zehere. Sine was the third of six children. Zehere passed away from breast cancer in 1967. Mike expanded his business to the Fort Chipwyan area while Sine and his siblings tended to the local businesses in the Lac La Biche area.

answer: The Chadi family was among the first Lebanese settlers in Canada. He has a sister and five brothers. His father, Mike, and his wife, Zeher, had six children. Zeher died from breast cancer at 34 years old. Mike expanded his business focus to the Fort Chipwyan area and opened a general store.

text: The genders of his siblings are unattested, and the total number of siblings is incorrect.

refinement: The Chadi family was among the first Lebanese settlers in Canada. He has five siblings. His father, Mike, and his wife, Zeher, had six children. Zeher died from breast cancer at 34 years old. Mike expanded his business focus to the Fort Chipwyan area and opened a general store.

answer: The Chadi family was among the first Lebanese settlers in Canada. He has a sister and five brothers. His father, Mike, and his wife, Zeher, had six children. Zeher died from breast cancer at 34 years old. Mike expanded his business focus to the Fort Chipwyan area and opened a general store. Mike and Zeher had six children, of which Sine was the third.

text: There is a redundancy in the number of children his parents had.

refinement: The Chadi family was among the first Lebanese settlers in Canada. He has a sister and five brothers. His father, Mike, and his wife, Zeher, had six children, of which Sine was the third. Zeher died from breast cancer at 34 years old. Mike expanded his business focus to the Fort Chipwyan area and opened a general store.

text: The genders of his siblings are unattested (and the number is incorrect).

refinement: The Chadi family was among the first Lebanese settlers in Canada.His father, Mike, and his wife, Zeher, had six children, of which Sine was the third. Zeher died from breast cancer at 34 years old. Mike expanded his business focus to the Fort Chipwyan area and opened a general store.

answer: The Chadi family is one of the first Lebanese settlers in Canada. They were among the first settlers in the Lac La Biche area. Sine's father was Mike (Mahmoud) and his wife Zeher had six children, of which Sine was the third. Zeher passed away from breast cancer at the age of 34 in 1967. Mike expanded his business to Fort Chipwyan and opened a general store there in 1972 while his children looked after the local businesses in the Lac La Biche area. Sine graduated from High School in Lac La Biche in 1973.

text: Sine's high school is not relevant.

refinement: The Chadi family is one of the first Lebanese settlers in Canada. They were among the first settlers in the Lac La Biche area. Sine's father was Mike (Mahmoud) and his wife Zeher had six children, of which Sine was the third. Zeher passed away from breast cancer at the age of 34 in 1967. Mike expanded his business to Fort Chipwyan and opened a general store there in 1972 while his children looked after the local businesses in the Lac La Biche area.

answer: He is the third child of his father, Mike, and mother, Zeher. His parents were among Canada's first Lebanese settlers, coming to Lac La Biche, Alberta in 1895. Sine's father Mike and his wife, Zeher, had six children, of whom Sine was the third. Zeher died at the age of 34 of breast cancer in 1967. Mike was involved in the fur trade and general store business in both the Lac La Biche and Fort Chipwyatt areas. Chadi was involved in these family businesses. Zsin raising finance for Edmonton's Islamic Academy, which educates and nurture Islamic students to enrich their faith, ws interested in the Muslim faith as a young Muslim boy

text: It is not stated that his parents were the ones who made the move to Lac La Biche.

refinement: He is the third child of his father, Mike, and mother, Zeher. His family was among Canada's first Lebanese settlers, coming to Lac La Biche, Alberta in 1895. Sine's father Mike and his wife, Zeher, had six children, of whom Sine was the third. Zeher died at the age of 34 of breast cancer in 1967. Mike was involved in the fur trade and general store business in both the Lac La Biche and Fort Chipwyatt areas. Chadi was involved in these family businesses. Zsin raising finance for Edmonton's Islamic Academy, which educates and nurture Islamic students to enrich their faith, ws interested in the Muslim faith as a young Muslim boy

text: The last line is nonsensical and unnecessary.

refinement: He is the third child of his father, Mike, and mother, Zeher. His family was among Canada's first Lebanese settlers, coming to Lac La Biche, Alberta in 1895. Sine's father Mike and his wife, Zeher, had six children, of whom Sine was the third. Zeher died at the age of 34 of breast cancer in 1967. Mike was involved in the fur trade and general store business in both the Lac La Biche and Fort Chipwyatt areas. Chadi was involved in these family businesses.

answer: Sine Chadi's father is Mike and his mother Zehere. His father was born in 1899, making him at least 110 when Sine was born. Zehere was Mike's second wife, and she passed away from breast cancer in 1967 at the age of 34 (Sine was only 18 years-old). Mike, Sine and Zeher had 6 children (three girls and three boys), of which all 3 boys were named Mahmoud. Past revolutions led to many Lebanese emigrating out of Lebanon, and they came to Canada and settled in the Lac La Biche area in Alberta, where they participated in the trade of furs and provided great competition to the Hudson's Bay Company. Sine's parents Mike and Zehe had 6 children, of which 3 were boys named Sine and Mike.

text: Sine's father's age is incorrect.

refinement: Sine Chadi's father is Mike and his mother Zehere. Zehere was Mike's second wife, and she passed away from breast cancer in 1967 at the age of 34 (Sine was only 18 years-old). Mike, Sine and Zeher had 6 children (three girls and three boys), of which all 3 boys were named Mahmoud. Past revolutions led to many Lebanese emigrating out of Lebanon, and they came to Canada and settled in the Lac La Biche area in Alberta, where they participated in the trade of furs and provided great competition to the Hudson's Bay Company. Sine's parents Mike and Zehe had 6 children, of which 3 were boys named Sine and Mike.

text: The text does not state that Zehere was Mike's second wife.

refinement: Sine Chadi's father is Mike and his mother Zehere. Zehere passed away from breast cancer in 1967 at the age of 34 (Sine was only 18 years-old). Mike, Sine and Zeher had 6 children (three girls and three boys), of which all 3 boys were named Mahmoud. Past revolutions led to many Lebanese emigrating out of Lebanon, and they came to Canada and settled in the Lac La Biche area in Alberta, where they participated in the trade of furs and provided great competition to the Hudson's Bay Company. Sine's parents Mike and Zehe had 6 children, of which 3 were boys named Sine and Mike.

text: Sine would have been 11 or so when his mother passed away.

refinement: Sine Chadi's father is Mike and his mother Zehere. Zehere passed away from breast cancer in 1967 at the age of 34. Mike, Sine and Zeher had 6 children (three girls and three boys), of which all 3 boys were named Mahmoud. Past revolutions led to many Lebanese emigrating out of Lebanon, and they came to Canada and settled in the Lac La Biche area in Alberta, where they participated in the trade of furs and provided great competition to the Hudson's Bay Company. Sine's parents Mike and Zehe had 6 children, of which 3 were boys named Sine and Mike.

text: Mike, Sine, and Zeher did not all have children together, nor were the names and genders of those children provided.

refinement: Sine Chadi's father is Mike and his mother Zehere. Zehere passed away from breast cancer in 1967 at the age of 34. Mike and Zeher had 6 children, of which Sine was the third. Past revolutions led to many Lebanese emigrating out of Lebanon, and they came to Canada and settled in the Lac La Biche area in Alberta, where they participated in the trade of furs and provided great competition to the Hudson's Bay Company. Sine's parents Mike and Zehe had 6 children, of which 3 were boys named Sine and Mike.

text: The last line is incorrect.

refinement: Sine Chadi's father is Mike and his mother Zehere. Zehere passed away from breast cancer in 1967 at the age of 34. Mike and Zeher had 6 children, of which Sine was the third. Past revolutions led to many Lebanese emigrating out of Lebanon, and they came to Canada and settled in the Lac La Biche area in Alberta, where they participated in the trade of furs and provided great competition to the Hudson's Bay Company.

text: The last line does not focus on Sine's family.

refinement: Sine Chadi's father is Mike and his mother Zehere. Zehere passed away from breast cancer in 1967 at the age of 34. Mike and Zeher had 6 children, of which Sine was the third. The Chadi family was among Canada's first Lebanese settlers.

answer: He is the third child of his father, Mike, and mother, Zeher. His parents were among Canada's first Lebanese settlers, coming to Lac La Biche, Alberta in 1895. Sine's father Mike and his wife, Zeher, had six children, of whom Sine was the third. Zeher died at the age of 34 of breast cancer in 1967. Mike was involved in the fur trade and general store business in both the Lac La Biche and Fort Chipwyatt areas. He expanded to the Fort Chipwyan area in 1972. Chadi was involved in these family businesses. Zsin raising finance for Edmonton's Islamic Academy, which educates and nurture Islamic students to enrich their faith, ws interested in the Muslim faith as a young Muslim boy

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about Chadi's children?

answer: No answer

answer: The article mentions the number six, the first three being his brothers, the other three being his sisters. The big sister to Sine and the other two boys is called Zeher, who died at the age of 34 from breast cancer.

text: The article does not mention Chadi's children.

answer: No answer

answer: No answer

answer: No answer

answer: Chadi has six children. His father Mike (Mahmoud) and his wife Zeher had six children, of which Sine was the third. Zeher Chadi passed away from breast cancer at the young age of 34 in 1967. Mike Chadi expanded his business focus to the Fort Chipwyan area and opened a general store in that area in 1972 while Sine Chadi and his siblings looked after the local businesses in the Lac La Biche area.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about the type of person Chadi is?

answer: Chadi is a businessman, philanthropist and former politician. He is also known for his rousing auctioneering activities and his generosity. He is an active participant in fundraising activities for many organizations. He has also been a lead organizer for E4C, an organization focused on anti-poverty initiatives and operator of Edmonton City Hall's Hallway Café which provides job and life skills support to vulnerable youth. He also serves as a Director of the Parkinson Association of Alberta and of the Gordon and Diane Buchanan Family Foundation, which has spearheaded the construction and operation of the $6 million Buchanan Centre as a wellness centre for people suffering from Parkinson disease.

answer: Chadi was a politician and businessman who was known for his rousing auctioneering activities and his generosity. He was an active participant in the fundraising activities of many organizations and was known for his support of many community groups and charities. He was an organizer for E4C, an organization focused on anti-poverty initiatives and operator of Edmonton City Hall's Hallway Café which provides job and life skills support to vulnerable youth. He is currently a Director of the Parkinson Association of Alberta and of the Gordon and Diane Buchanan Family Foundation, which has spearheaded the construction and operation of the $6 million Buchanan Centre as a wellness centre for people suffering from Parkinson disease. He has also served on the Board of the Capital Care Foundation and continues to financially support the organization.

text: Answer should be in present tense.

refinement: Chadi is a politician and businessman who is known for his rousing auctioneering activities and his generosity. He is an active participant in the fundraising activities of many organizations and is known for his support of many community groups and charities. He was an organizer for E4C, an organization focused on anti-poverty initiatives and operator of Edmonton City Hall's Hallway Café which provides job and life skills support to vulnerable youth. He is currently a Director of the Parkinson Association of Alberta and of the Gordon and Diane Buchanan Family Foundation, which has spearheaded the construction and operation of the $6 million Buchanan Centre as a wellness centre for people suffering from Parkinson disease. He has also served on the Board of the Capital Care Foundation and continues to financially support the organization.

answer: He takes his business practices seriously having started working in the construction and management of retail fuel service centres. He proceeds to develop interests into restaurant and insurance business, mortgages, and real estate. Chadi is highly philanthropic, offering support to many community causes. He has offered advisory business relationship to many of the people who works in his companies. In 2008, Chadi was appointed to the board of Capital Care foundation where he is the only non-medical expert in their board and he also served as their finance chair. He is also an active fundraiser with a charitable heart.

text: The article does not mention the restaurant business.

refinement: He takes his business practices seriously having started working in the construction and management of retail fuel service centres. He proceeds to develop interests into the insurance business, mortgages, and real estate. Chadi is highly philanthropic, offering support to many community causes. He has offered advisory business relationship to many of the people who works in his companies. In 2008, Chadi was appointed to the board of Capital Care foundation where he is the only non-medical expert in their board and he also served as their finance chair. He is also an active fundraiser with a charitable heart.

text: "proceeds" should be "proceeded"

refinement: He takes his business practices seriously having started working in the construction and management of retail fuel service centres. He proceeded to develop interests into the insurance business, mortgages, and real estate. Chadi is highly philanthropic, offering support to many community causes. He has offered advisory business relationship to many of the people who works in his companies. In 2008, Chadi was appointed to the board of Capital Care foundation where he is the only non-medical expert in their board and he also served as their finance chair. He is also an active fundraiser with a charitable heart.

text: The line about advisory business relationships is unattested.

refinement: He takes his business practices seriously having started working in the construction and management of retail fuel service centres. He proceeded to develop interests into the insurance business, mortgages, and real estate. Chadi is highly philanthropic, offering support to many community causes. In 2008, Chadi was appointed to the board of Capital Care foundation where he is the only non-medical expert in their board and he also served as their finance chair. He is also an active fundraiser with a charitable heart.

text: The statement that he is the only non-medical expert on the Capital Care board and served as their finance chair is unattested (as is the year he was appointed).

refinement: He takes his business practices seriously having started working in the construction and management of retail fuel service centres. He proceeded to develop interests into the insurance business, mortgages, and real estate. Chadi is highly philanthropic, offering support to many community causes. Chadi was also appointed to the board of Capital Care foundation. He is also an active fundraiser with a charitable heart.

text: Rather than state he is an active fundraiser, the answer could mention some of his specific efforts.

refinement: He takes his business practices seriously having started working in the construction and management of retail fuel service centres. He proceeded to develop interests into the insurance business, mortgages, and real estate. Chadi is highly philanthropic, offering support to many community causes. Chadi was also appointed to the board of Capital Care foundation. He is a Director of the Parkinson Association of Alberta and of the Gordon and Diane Buchanan Family Foundation.

answer: Chadi is a businessman, philanthropist and former politician. He is also known for his rousing auctioneering activities and his generosity. He is an active participant in fundraising activities for many organizations. He has also been a lead organizer for E4C, an organization focused on anti-poverty initiatives and operator of Edmonton City Hall's Hallway Café which provides job and life skills support to vulnerable youth. He also serves as a Director of the Parkinson Association of Alberta and of the Gordon and Diane Buchanan Family Foundation, which has spearheaded the construction and operation of the $6 million Buchanan Centre as a wellness centre for people suffering from Parkinson disease. He is also known for his generosity and rousing auctioneering activities.

text: The last sentence is redundant.

refinement: Chadi is a businessman, philanthropist and former politician. He is also known for his rousing auctioneering activities and his generosity. He is an active participant in fundraising activities for many organizations. He has also been a lead organizer for E4C, an organization focused on anti-poverty initiatives and operator of Edmonton City Hall's Hallway Café which provides job and life skills support to vulnerable youth. He also serves as a Director of the Parkinson Association of Alberta and of the Gordon and Diane Buchanan Family Foundation, which has spearheaded the construction and operation of the $6 million Buchanan Centre as a wellness centre for people suffering from Parkinson disease.

answer: Chadi is a businessman, philanthropist, and former politician. The Chadi family was one of Canada's first Lebanese settlers and they settled in Alberta in 1895. The family was known for their participation in the fur trade and running a general store. Chadi also fundraises for many charitable causes. He also supports the community financially by advising them about their businesses, as well as campaigning for various causes.

text: The details about the Chadi family are not relevant.

refinement: Chadi is a businessman, philanthropist, and former politician. Chadi also fundraises for many charitable causes. He also supports the community financially by advising them about their businesses, as well as campaigning for various causes.

text: The last line should mention some specific efforts rather than vague generalizations.

refinement: Chadi is a businessman, philanthropist, and former politician. Chadi also fundraises for many charitable causes. He was a fundraising chair for a $7 million campaign for the Glenrose Rehabilitation Hospital Foundation, was a lead organizer for E4C, an anti-povert organization, and serves as Director of the Parkinson Association of Alberta.

answer: He takes his business practices seriously having started working in the construction and management of retail fuel service centres. He proceeds to develop interests into restaurant and insurance business, mortgages, and real estate. Chadi is highly philanthropic, offering support to many community causes. He offers advisory business relationship to many of the people who works in his companies. In 2008, Chadi was appointed to the board of Capital Care foundation where he is the only non-medical expert in their board and he also served as their finance chair. He is also an active fundraiser with a charitable heart.

answer: Chadi is a businessman, philanthropist, and former politician. The Chadi family was one of Canada's first Lebanese settlers and they settled in Alberta in 1895. The family was known for their participation in the fur trade and running a general store. Chadi also fundraises for many charitable causes. He also supports the community financially and by advising them about their businesses.


split: train

text:
“Goodbye”, a clear and unmistakeable message. Albeit no more meaningful in the broad spectrum of human existence than any other word in the English language. What was it about this particular word that made Mark Coleridge decide it to be his final assertion in life? Surely there existed other, more meaningful, less succinct choices within this young man’s vocabulary? Yet, it was this, a singularly simple form of farewell, that was to be his final utterance upon a perpetually spinning, green Earth. To be certain, it was a “goodbye” punctuated by a single gunshot which ended the life of one Mark Coleridge, aged 25 years.

I saw the entire sequence of events unfold from my office window, overlooking the square. The once tranquil sea of people became a frenzied mob. Spectators were running this way and that way, while a group of policemen, who had been standing just a few meters away from the gunshot, rushed in to assess the situation. To say that the gunshot had not startled me would be to tell a grave untruth. Indeed, although I been surveying the crowd for anything remotely interesting to take my mind off of the monotony of the endless paperwork, the last thing I expected was to see what would became my next and final case unfold right in front of my very eyes. My eyes had been following a young man who was by my estimate, no older than thirty but could not have been any younger than twenty-three . It had been his bright blond hair which had caught my attention. Hair so bright that it was like a lighthouse, guiding the ships of my eyes away from the rocks of his darker haired neighbours and towards his beckoning presence.

Just before the gunshot there had been a fierce wind, as if the tragedy that is human death was borne aloft upon its ephemeral wings. I could tell by the great display of flags which provided a backdrop to the day’s hectic events. But as I now type out how the sequence of events did unfold and reveal themselves to me that day I cannot help but think, that the wind was meaningless, just another random occurrence in the day-to-day events that led to where I am now. This young man, whom I had been following with my eyes for a good five minutes, started at the fringes of the crowd and slowly weaved his way to the centre by the fountain which gushed forth the waters of anticipation. Like an ant he was, meandering, twisting, and dodging in and out of a wave of people. When he reached a location which was pleasing to his volition, this was on the ledge of the fountain, situated in the centre of the square. He paused for a few moments, seemingly reflecting on all that was good with the world.

Even through the glass of my office window, I could tell that something heavy was weighing down upon his mind. I could feel the sweat dripping down from his forehead and onto his shaking hands. It was then that he suddenly stood up, procuring from his pocket, a magnum revolver, with which he jammed the muzzle underneath his chin, which I could see was shiny with the perspiration of one whose fate now lay within the cold steel barrel of an imported American pistol. I do not remember whether it was the sound of the gunshot at which I jumped or whether it was the sight of this young man, who, in the prime of his youth, seemingly had so much to live for, being blown into oblivion by a small fragment of lead, now ingrained firmly and permanently into his mangled skull.
I watched for another hour, I cannot remember the exact time that I remained beside my window. Perhaps it was in some benign tribute to the fallen man that I lingered; Or perhaps I was simply curious as to what would happen next - I had never seen a suicide before. It was when the ambulance came to collect his body that I finally turned away from the window. The sun was setting low over the buildings which faced the square opposite my own. It was then with a sigh that I  thought how much of a terrible tragedy the day’s events had witnessed. And then, it was with a greater sigh that I returned to finish the last of the paperwork which lay sprawled before me on the desk.

I took the bus home. The sun was saying its final farewells to the world before it suddenly vanished in a ball of flame. I observed all of this on the bus ride home and fleetingly thought that the sun was just like that young man I had witnessed in the square. The only difference being that the sun was sure to rise again, unlike the young man, whose only certainty lay with him in a newly-dug grave. But I thought no more of it as the bus pulled up next to the curb and opened its doors to let myself and several other passengers out. It was my stop, you see and waiting for me at the bus-stop were my lovely wife, Susan, and my two kids, Isaac and Mary. They smiled at me. “How was work, daddy?” my youngest, Mary, sweetly inquired. “Oh,” my mind drifted back to the young man in the bright blonde hair. How innocent he had seemed when I first laid my eyes on him through the office window. “It was certainly interesting, Mary, my dear.” Isaac, my eldest child, who was perpetually adding on inane questions to perfectly reasonable ones, piped up “in what way it was interesting, Daddy?” My eyes flashed daggers of annoyance through my glasses, although none of my family was perceptive enough to notice. “Daddy had a lot of paperwork that was supposed to go to a very important man.” I replied, so nonchalantly, that not a trace of my annoyance revealed itself to my family. We rounded the corner of the street and approached our little terraced house. “Come inside, dear” my wife lilted, “I have dinner on the table waiting for you.” As the smell of freshly baked potato wafted through my nostrils all previous thoughts of the young blonde-haired man disappeared as promptly as the setting sun did not but a little while ago.

title: Chapter 1 of my first novel. Reddit go easy on me!

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about Mark Coleridge?

answer: Mark Coleridge committed suicide in the city square. He was 25 years old. He calmly walked to the center of the square and shot himself in the head with a pistol.

answer: The text portrays Mark Coleridge as a young man who commits suicide by shooting himself in the head. The text also outlines the sequence of events leading up to the suicide and the aftermath. Overall, the text portrays Mark Coleridge as someone who seemingly had a lot to live for yet ultimately decided to take his own life.

answer: Mark Coleridge was a young man of not more than 25 years old. He had bright blond hair that was so intense, it was like a lighthouse. Mark weaved his way towards the fountain at the center of the square. He pulled out a magnum revolver and committed suicide. The last thing Mark said was "goodbye".

answer: The text implies that Mark Coleridge's final farewell was his suicide by gunshot. The young man appeared to be thoughtful, reflective, and troubled prior to the gunshot. The suicide resulted in a much-felt tragedy for everyone involved. Overall, the text portrays Mark Coleridge as tragic and young.

answer: Mark Coleridge commits suicide after watching the sunset. He had thought hard and long about the decision and is now resolved to end his life. He places the barrel of his gun squarely underneath his chin and pulls the trigger. The sound of the gunshot has been forever imprinted in the narrator's memory.

text: The response includes details that are not evidenced in the passage and therefore inaccurate.

refinement: Mark Coleridge commits suicide. He had resolved to end his life. He places the barrel of his gun squarely underneath his chin and pulls the trigger. The sound of the gunshot has been forever imprinted in the narrator's memory.

text: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

refinement: Mark Coleridge commits suicide. He had resolved to end his life. He places the barrel of his gun squarely underneath his chin and pulls the trigger.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about the narrator?

answer: The narrator watches the events of a young man's suicide unfold and seems somewhat detached to their implications. The final impression left by the narrator is one of contemplation and introspection, as they reflect on the consequences of suicide and whether or not it is an event worth remembering. The narrator also seems focused on their own life and loved ones, despite being witness to something terrible. Overall, the narrator seems thoughtful, observant and somewhat aloof to the tragedy happening in the narrative.

answer: The narrator is a man, probably an officer of the law. He probably works in an office or the police station or a bureaucracy of some sorts. He sees someone commit a crime in public and is drawn to this person. He's skilled at paperwork and knows how to investigate. He is married to Susan and has two children, Isaac and Mary.

text: The response includes mentioning details and assumptions that are not evidenced in the text.

refinement: The narrator is a man who works in an office. He sees someone commit suicide in public and is drawn to this person. He's finishes his paperwork and goes home to his family. He is married to Susan and has two children, Isaac and Mary.

answer: The narrator is married to his wife Susan. They have two kids, Isaac, the eldest, and Mary, the youngest. He works in an office that overlooks the center of the square. The narrator finds the paperwork involved in his job boring, which is why he often engages in people-watching. He witnesses the suicide of 25-year-old Mark Coleridge, whom he was watching from his office window across the street.

answer: The narrator is an office worker who is observing events unfold from a window overlooking the square. He seems interested and intrigued by the crowd gathered in the square and is keen to know what is happening. He does not really work with people who are directly connected to what is happening; he has paperwork that seems important but an objective observer. As time progresses he becomes weary of the monotony at the window and finds himself staring at the mundane and dull crowd. He has a family waiting and wanting to get home, which seems important.

text: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

refinement: The narrator is an office worker who is observing events unfold from a window overlooking the square. He seems interested and intrigued by the crowd gathered in the square and is keen to know what is happening. He does not really work with people who are directly connected to what is happening. As time progresses he becomes weary of the monotony at the window and finds himself staring at the mundane and dull crowd. He has a family waiting and wanting to get home, which seems important.

text: There's no evidence in the passage to suggest that the narrator was becoming weary of the monotony of the window.

refinement: The narrator is an office worker who is observing events unfold from a window overlooking the square. He seems interested and intrigued by the crowd gathered in the square and is keen to know what is happening. He does not really work with people who are directly connected to what is happening. He has a family waiting and wanting to get home, which seems important.

answer: The narrator is observant, curious, and interested in finding the meaning behind the events he witnessed.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

How did the narrator's thoughts about the suicide he just witnessed change throughout the story?

answer: It went from him getting sad about the suicide to him realizing he needs to go home and he just doesn't care about the person who killed himself.

answer:
He had been watching a man just before the suicide from his office window, and felt something was amiss. Then, when the blond guy shot himself, his brain reflexively tried to reconcile this, because he had seen the guy for about five minutes walking around in the crowd and never felt any sense of alarm. The narrator notes how this guy, with very bright hair, wanted to stay among the people, how it was a nice world what with the sun setting and all. Sadly, the narrator notices the man shot himself, and in the end, he relays he felt sorry for the man and his family.

The guy who shot himself, Mark Coleridge, seemed as innocent as could be when the narrator first laid eyes on him. Waiting all day in the office was something out of boredom. Just watching this man wander around and appreciate the day led the narrator to believe that Mark might have waged a lone, but with something weighing heavy on his mind.

Seeing fleetingly like a dark figure, the narrator notes how Mark procured the revolver, which is where he snapped out of the reverie and realized that the man pulled the trigger. What at first felt like a violent but mostly peaceful day - witnessing the reasons and formation of crowds - was turned full 180 degrees by this event. Seeing the onlookers watch and head for their activities, it gave the narrator renewed hope in all the things he missed.

text: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

refinement:
He had been watching a man just before the suicide from his office window, and felt something was amiss. Then, when the blond guy shot himself, his brain reflexively tried to reconcile this, because he had seen the guy for about five minutes walking around in the crowd and never felt any sense of alarm. The narrator notes how this guy, with very bright hair, wanted to stay among the people, how it was a nice world what with the sun setting and all. Sadly, the narrator notices the man shot himself, and in the end, he relays he felt sorry for the man and his family.

The guy who shot himself, Mark Coleridge, seemed as innocent as could be when the narrator first laid eyes on him. Waiting all day in the office was something out of boredom. Just watching this man wander around and appreciate the day led the narrator to believe that Mark might have waged a lone, but with something weighing heavy on his mind.

Seeing fleetingly like a dark figure, the narrator notes how Mark procured the revolver, which is where he snapped out of the reverie and realized that the man pulled the trigger.

answer: The narrator's thoughts about the suicide evolve throughout the story. At first, the event seems shocking, but soon the narrator realizes that the tragedy was something he had never seen before. However, these thoughts are quickly pushed aside in order to focus on mundane, everyday concerns in the family. As soon as the family enters their home, the suicide is forgotten in order to focus on the more positive aspects of life.

answer: Initially the narrator is shocked by the suicide, but gradually his thoughts become less about the tragedy of the suicide and more about the ordinary aspects of his life. He ultimately becomes relatively apathetic in regards to the suicide, relegating it to the corner of his mind.

answer: The narrator was curious (and probably shocked) at first because he watched the events unfold for another hour in some benign tribute to the fallen man. He thought about the suicide on the bus ride home. The sun was setting during the bus ride home, and it suddenly vanished in a ball of flame. The narrator observed that the life of young Mark Coleridge was like the setting sun, the only difference is the sun will rise again tomorrow and Mark won't. When the narrator saw his family and smelled the food his wife cooked, thoughts of the blonde-haired man disappeared as promptly as the setting sun.


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GRAND RIVER HOSPITAL is a stop on the Region of Waterloo's Ion rapid transit system.[1] It is located in the median of King Street in Kitchener, between Pine and Mount Hope Streets, just north of its namesake, the KW Site of Grand River Hospital. It opened in 2019.

[_Spinal Column_] The station's feature wall consists of ceramic tiles in a solid hospital-blue. The station also features the artwork _Spinal Column_ by Sandra Dunn about the LRT being the backbone of the local economy.[2]

The primary access to the platform is from the crosswalk at Pine Street; secondary accesses at the west end of the platform, crossing either side of King Street, are marked as emergency exits only.

The station is also near Kitchener-Waterloo Collegiate, a major high school, and the CTV Kitchener studios.

[1]

[2]

title: Grand River Hospital station

question: When did Grand River Hospital Station open?

answer: Grand River Hospital Station opened in 2019.

answer: It opened in 2019.

answer: Grand River Hospital station opened in 2019.

question: How would you describe the station's interior design?

answer: The interior design of the Grand River Hospital station is minimalist, with ceramic tiles and artwork on display. The station's minimalist design speaks to the accessibility of the LRT and how it contributes to the local economy.

text: The text doesn't mention that the design is minimalist, and that could be a subjective judgment. There are tiles and artwork, so it is questionable to what degree that would be considered minimalist.

refinement: The interior design of the Grand River Hospital features ceramic tiles and artwork on display. The station's design speaks to the accessibility of the LRT and how it contributes to the local economy.

text: There is no discussion of accessibility of LRT in the text.

refinement: The interior design of the Grand River Hospital features ceramic tiles and artwork on display. The station's design speaks about the LRT and how it contributes to the local economy.

text: It is the artwork that speaks about LRT's positive effect on the local community.

refinement: The interior design of the Grand River Hospital features ceramic tiles and artwork on display. The artwork speaks about the LRT and how it contributes to the local economy.

text: The tiles are a solid hospital blue.

refinement: The interior design of the Grand River Hospital features solid hospital blue ceramic tiles and artwork on display. The artwork speaks about the LRT and how it contributes to the local economy.

text: The name of the artwork and the artist should be mentioned.

refinement: The interior design of the Grand River Hospital features solid hospital blue ceramic tiles and artwork "Spinal Column" by Sandra Dunn. The artwork speaks about the LRT and how it contributes to the local economy.

text:
'The station's feature wall consists of ceramic tiles in a solid hospital blue.'
'The station also features the artwork Spinal column.'

answer: The station features ceramic tiles with a hospital-blue colour scheme, with the artwork _Spinal Column_ on the wall. The station has a clean, modern design perfect for urban commuters.

text: There is no mention of 'modern' and 'perfect for urban commuters' in the text.

refinement: The station features ceramic tiles with a hospital-blue colour scheme, with the artwork _Spinal Column_ on the wall.

text: The name of the artist could be mentioned.

refinement: The station features ceramic tiles with a hospital-blue colour scheme, with the artwork _Spinal Column_ by Sandra Dunn on the wall.

answer: Grand River Hospital station has a feature wall which consists of ceramic tiles in a solid hospital blue. It also as the artwork, Spinal Column, created by Sandra Dunn.

text: A typo in the second sentence.

refinement: Grand River Hospital station has a feature wall which consists of ceramic tiles in a solid hospital blue. It also has the artwork, Spinal Column, created by Sandra Dunn.

question: Where is the Grand River Hospital station?

answer: It's between Pine and Mount Hope Streets.

text: The King Street should be mentioned.

refinement: It's in the median of King Street in Kitchener, between Pine and Mount Hope Streets.

answer: It is located in the median of King Street, in Kitchener, between Pine and Mount Hope Streets. It is near the Kitchener-Waterloo Collegiate and CTV Kitchener studios.

answer: The Grand River Hospital station is a stop on the Region of Waterloo's Ion rapid transit system.

text: The answer is not precise. The question was where the station is, not what it is.

refinement: The Grand River Hospital station is in the median of King Street in Kitchener, between Pine and Mount Hope Streets.

question: What other locations are near the Grand River Hospital Station?

answer: Other locations near this station are Kitchener-Waterloo Collegiate, a major high school, and the CTV Kitchener studios.

answer: Kitchener-Waterloo Collegiate is near the LRT station. The school is the closest at 2 kilometres. The CTV Kitchener studios are near the station at 2 kilometres.

text: The distance in kilometers is not mentioned in the text.

refinement: Kitchener-Waterloo Collegiate, a high school, is near the LRT station. The CTV Kitchener studios are also near the station.

text: The two sentences could be combined for better style.

refinement: Kitchener-Waterloo Collegiate, a high school, and the CTV Kitchener studios are near the station.

text: 'The station is also near Kitchener-Waterloo Collegiate, a major high school, and the CTV Kitchener studios.'

answer: Kitchener-Waterloo Collegiate and the CTV Kitchener studios are close to the station.

question: Write a ~1 sentence summary.

answer: The location of this new stop on the Region of Waterloo's Ion rapid transit system is during the construction, 2019, at Kitchener, and this stop is nearest King Street's crosswalk.

text: The start of the sentence is confusion. The summary should state what it is talking about in the first sentence.

refinement: Grand River Hospital station is a new stop on the Region of Waterloo's Ion rapid transit system is during the construction, 2019, at Kitchener, and this stop is nearest King Street's crosswalk.

text: 'During the construction' is confusing.

refinement: Grand River Hospital station is a new stop on the Region of Waterloo's Ion rapid transit system. It was opened in 2019, and this stop is nearest King Street's crosswalk.

text: The primary access is from the crosswalk at Pine Street, not King Street.

refinement: Grand River Hospital station is a new stop on the Region of Waterloo's Ion rapid transit system. It was opened in 2019, and its primary access is from the crosswalk at Pine Street.

answer:
Grand River Hospital is located in the median of King Street and is a stop on the Region of Waterloo's ION rapid transit system.

Grand River Hospital is located in the median of King Street in Kitchener and a stop on the Region of Waterloo's Ion rapid transit system.

text: The sentence is repeated.

refinement: Grand River Hospital is located in the median of King Street and is a stop on the Region of Waterloo's ION rapid transit system.

text: It should be clearer that the summary is about the stop, not the hospital.

refinement: Grand River Hospital station is located in the median of King Street and is a stop on the Region of Waterloo's ION rapid transit system.

text: The order of the facts could be changed for better style and clarity.

refinement: Grand River Hospital station is a stop on the Region of Waterloo's ION rapid transit system, and it is located in the median of King Street.

answer: There is a stop at the hospital, which has ceramic tiles in hospital-blue which symbolize the hospital.

text: The summary should state which stop it is talking about.

refinement: Grand River Hospital station has ceramic tiles in hospital-blue which symbolize the hospital.

text: The location of the stop should be mentioned.

refinement: Grand River Hospital station is a stop on the Region of Waterloo's ion rapid transit system. It has ceramic tiles in hospital-blue which symbolize the hospital.

answer: This article describes the design and attractions of the Grand River Hospital station.

text: The location of the stop should be mentioned.

refinement: This article describes the design and attractions of the Grand River Hospital station, a stop on the Region of Waterloo's ion rapid transit system.

answer: The Grand River Hospital Station is located on the north side of King Street, between Pine and Mount Hope Streets, just north of the hospital.

text: The summary should mention which system the station is a part of.

refinement: The Grand River Hospital Station is a stop on the Region of Waterloo's ion rapid transit system. It is located on the north side of King Street, between Pine and Mount Hope Streets, just north of the hospital.

text: It is located in the median of Kind street in Kitchener.

refinement: The Grand River Hospital Station is a stop on the Region of Waterloo's ion rapid transit system. It is located in the median of King Street, between Pine and Mount Hope Streets, just north of the hospital.

answer: Grand River Hospital Station is located on the Ion rapid transit line in Kitchener, Ontario. The station connects to the hospital's emergency department, loads of schools, and popular with students.

text: Ontario is not mentioned in the text.

refinement: Grand River Hospital Station is a stop on the Region of Waterloo's Ion rapid transit line. The station connects to the hospital's emergency department, loads of schools, and popular with students.

text: The second sentence is not in the text.

refinement: Grand River Hospital Station is a stop on the Region of Waterloo's Ion rapid transit line.


text:
As with all intricately planned crimes, there's always something that crumbles, one detail that causes things to break apart. Tonight was no exception… the fridge opened for the fifth time, was it nerves? Hunger? Who knew, all he knew was that mustard and canned beans probably wouldn't taste good. He sat back down to wait; it wasn’t going to be long. The ringing phone pierced the silence his heart dropped as he knew that it was time. “Come down” the voice on the other end screeched.

He boarded the elevator hesitating for a moment before hitting the basement key. A thousand scenarios ran thru his mind as the floors went by, how was he going to handle this, what was the boss going to say? The elevator doors sprang open, Rhonda stood there with an aggravated look about her face, “Let’s go were already late” they got in to the Tahoe and got on to the main road Todd looked out the window the street lights passing quickly “slow down were not that late” he barked, Rhonda slammed on the breaks and then the gas “slow enough for you?” a brief stare was shared and they went back to ignoring each other

They pulled up to the house and got out of the truck “see we are late all the lights are out” Rhonda said staring a hole thru Todd “it’ll be alright I know where the breaker box is”. You better she barked, they walked around the side of the house found the box and cut the power and walked to the back door, it was unlocked, “this wasn’t part of the plan” thought Todd. Must have been an over sight by Mr. Pol Rhonda whispered. “Yeah” Todd said as they walked in. Todd kicked the flash light on as they searched for the master bed room. They crept to the end of the hall; Rhonda went for the door knob “wait” exclaimed Todd. “Fuck you” Rhonda muttered, as she opened the door the flashlight went off and their eyes began adjusting to the dark. Rhonda was first in and as her eyes came in to focus she noticed the bed was empty, the lights hit, Rhonda froze, no heart beat, no breath.

“Did you really think he’d just sit back a let you do it?” Todd said calmly. “Fuck you Todd this was the plan from the beginning” she said thru broken breath. Todd’s eyes grew wide “what do you mean?” “Bruce knows all about what I did, it was all part of the plan” he broke concentration for only a few seconds “don’t lie bitch, Bruce is the one that put the bounty on your head” he yelled. She turned around and looked him dead in the eye “I wouldn’t lie”

CRACK, the gun shot rang out thru the house and the valley Todd looked down at the crimson liquid pouring out of his chest as he dropped to his knees his last thought was “she didn’t lie”
their stood Bruce, .357 still smoking. “About time you showed up” Rhonda said with a look of relief across her face. A smirk came across Bruce’s face. “What was Todd babbling about” Rhonda said with confusion in her voice. “Not babbling, all true sweet heart” Bruce said coldly. “Wha” CRACK a second shot rang out thru the valley, Rhonda stumbled back in to the corner “wh..Why” she said thru gasping breath. “Why would I pay this kid to do a job I am perfectly capable of performing” Bruce said wile wiping down the gun with a velvet cloth he pulled from his jacket. As Rhonda bled out she looked up at bruce and spit out her last words, “you never ran shit”. Bruce looked down with a grin “I do now”.

title: The boss.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Did Bruce put a bounty on Rhonda?

answer: Yes.

answer: Yes, it is clear that Rhonda was hired to carry out a task for which Bruce could have performed himself. Bruce shot Rhonda when she was unsuccessful in carrying out the task.

text: We can't say for sure that Rhonda was not successful.

refinement: Unknown. It is clear that Rhonda was hired to carry out a task for which Bruce could have performed himself. Bruce shot Rhonda when it as soon as she and Todd were in his line of sight.

answer: Unclear information.

text: It was clear enough, according to the passage.

refinement: According to Todd, Bruce did put a bounty on Rhonda.

answer: Yes, Rhonda stated that Bruce put the bounty on her head.

text: It was not Rhonda who made that declaration.

refinement: Yes, Todd stated that Bruce put the bounty on Rhonda's head.

answer: Yes, he planned the whole thing

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Will Todd be betrayed by Bruce?

answer: Yes.

text: Todd was already betrayed when Bruce shot him.

refinement: Yes. Bruce betrayed Todd when he shot him.

answer: Yes, it is implied that Todd was betrayed when Bruce shot him.

answer: Yes.

text: Todd was already betrayed when Bruce shot him.

refinement: Bruce shooting Todd is an act of betrayal.

answer: Todd and Rhonda are killed by Bruce.

text: Todd was already betrayed when Bruce shot him.

answer: Yes, Bruce betrayed Todd by shooting him.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Will Rhonda be betrayed by Bruce?

answer: Yes, Bruce shoots Rhonda.

answer: Yes, Rhonda will be betrayed by Bruce. Bruce orchestrated the plan for Rhonda to kill Todd so that he could take over.

answer: Yes.

text: Rhonda was already betrayed by Bruce when he shot her.

answer: Bruce reveals that he framed Rhonda and paid Todd to kill her.

answer: Yes, Rhonda will be betrayed by Bruce. Rhonda mistakenly assumed that Bruce wanted her to do the job and when Todd revealed the truth about Bruce's involvement, Rhonda realized her mistake. Todd was also killed by Bruce as a result of this betrayal when he revealed his knowledge.

question: Write a ~4 sentence summary.

answer: Todd and Rhonda are late to Bruce's house when the power goes out when they cut the electricity. They wait downstairs in the dark for Todd to tell Bruce that he's there and that he knows what Bruce is there for. Rhonda shoots Todd. Todd tells her that he was lying. Then Bruce shoots Rhonda.

text: Todd did not tell Bruce that he is there.

refinement: Todd and Rhonda cut the power as soon as they entered the house. They search around the house and soon a shot rang out - Bruce shot Todd. Bruce then turns his gun on Rhonda and shot her, saying that he set both of them up.

answer: The narrator reports that his crime goes horribly wrong. Todd, the narrator, and Rhonda go to a house to rob it on Bruce's orders. Todd claims that Rhonda lied to him and stated that Bruce knows about their crime and was the one to pin the money on her. Rhonda says that Todd should know that she wouldn't lie. Bruce kills them both.

answer: The protagonist arrives at the location for a robbery led by their boss Rhonda. When they arrive, they find that the master bedroom is empty and realize that their boss is double crossing them. Rhonda shoots the protagonist before being gunned down by their boss; she admits that the robbery was part of a bigger plan orchestrated by Bruce. The robbery is ultimately unsuccessful.

text: Rhonda isn't Todd's boss.

refinement: The protagonist arrives at the location for a robbery alongside Rhonda. When they arrive, they find that the master bedroom is empty and realize that their boss is double-crossing them. Bruce, their boss, shot both of them, revealing that he set them up.

answer: The protagonist, a robber, meets the boss at their house. The phone rings and Rhonda tells them that they are late. The house is unlocked which was not part of the plan. They enter the master bedroom and the bed is empty. Rhonda realizes that the boss had intentionally put a bounty on her head. Just as she finishes this realization, the boss shoots her. The boss admits that he had planned the whole scheme himself and now runs the show.

text: Lack of clarity in the second sentence and the rest of the answer - "Rhonda tells them that they are late". I have no idea who "them" are.

refinement: Todd and Rhonda infiltrated a house. They enter the master bedroom and found the bed is empty. Shots are fired as Todd realizes he's been shot. Their boss, Bruce, emerges from the shadows with a smoking gun as he shot Rhonda too. Bruce reveals he set Todd and Rhonda up.

answer: Rhonda and Todd try to do a job that is illegal. As they are committing their crime Todd tells Rhonda Bruce put a bounty on her head. She claims that is impossible, because Bruce knew about the job. Bruce arrives and shoots both Rhonda and Todd, saying that he is in charge now.

text: It is easier to say Todd and Rhonda were engaged in an armed robbery.

refinement: Rhonda and Todd are engaged in an armed robbery. As they are committing their crime Todd tells Rhonda Bruce has a bounty on her head. She claims that is impossible since Bruce knew about the job. Bruce arrives and shoots both Rhonda and Todd, saying that he is in charge now.


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[Sights and Sounds on Sundays: Mallarmé Chamber Players]

SUNDAY, NOVEMBER 1, 2015 | 3:00 PM
SECU AUDITORIUM, EAST BUILDING

Inspired by the exhibition _The Worlds of M. C. Escher_, the Mallarmé Chamber Players have chosen a fascinating work by J. S. Bach that’s meant to be experienced from multiple perspectives.

The Durham-based ensemble performs the entire Bach _Musical Offering_ on baroque period instruments, featuring Elizabeth Field, baroque violin; Suzanne Rousso, baroque viola; Stephanie Vial, baroque cello, Rebecca Troxler, traverso flute; and Elaine Funaro, harpsichord.

Docent-led tours of featured works of art are offered at 1:45 pm. Please make reservations one week prior by calling the Box Office, (919) 715-5923, at least one week in advance. Escher exhibition ticket (discounted price) required for tour.

question: What is the Mallarme Chamber Players?

answer: The Mallarme Chamber Players are a Durham-based ensemble.

answer: The Mallarmé Chamber Players is a group of musicians who play baroque music on period instruments.

answer: The Mallarme Chamber Players are a Durham-based ensemble that performs the entire Bach Musical Offering on baroque period instruments.

answer: The Mallarmé Chamber Players is a group of musicians who will be performing a piece by J.S. Bach.

question: What piece are they playing?

answer: They are playing a work by J.S. Bach.

answer: The Mallarmé Chamber Players are playing the Bach Musical Offering.

text: 'A Bach musical offering' is a better way to describe what they will play.

refinement: The Mallarmé Chamber Players are playing a Bach musical offering.

answer: The Mallarmé Chamber Players are playing the entire Bach "Musical Offering."

text: Answer should more accurately reflect the fact that it is a single Bach offering.

refinement: The Mallarmé Chamber Players are playing a musical offering from Bach.

answer: The Mallarmé Chamber Players are playing the entire Bach Musical Offering.

text: The answer should more accurately reflect that they are playing a single Bach offering.

refinement: The Mallarmé Chamber Players are playing a Bach musical offering.

question: What times are the docent-led tours?

answer: 1:45 pm

answer: The docent-led tours are offered at 1:45 pm.

answer: The docent-led tours are at 1:45pm.

answer: The docent-led tours are offered at 1:45 pm.

question: How far in advance should one make a ticket reservation?

answer: One should make a ticket reservation at least one week in advance in order to attend the concert.

answer: Tickets should be reserved a week in advance.

answer: One week in advance.

answer: One week in advance.

question: Write a ~3 sentence summary.

answer: The Mallarmé Chamber Players will be performing a piece by J.S. Bach, inspired by the exhibition "The Worlds of M.C. Escher." The performance will take place at the Secu Auditorium on Sunday, November 1st at 3pm. Tours of the Escher exhibition are available before the performance, and tickets must be purchased in advance.

answer: The Mallarme Chamber Players, inspired by the exhibition "The Worlds of M.C. Escher," will be playing a piece by J.S. Bach.

answer: The Mallarmé Chamber Players perform a work by J.S. Bach on baroque period instruments. The performance is inspired by the exhibition "The Worlds of M.C. Escher." Docent-led tours of featured works of art are offered at 1:45 pm.

answer: The Mallarmé Chamber Players will be performing a Bach piece on baroque period instruments. Docent-led tours of featured works of art are offered at 1:45 pm.

text: Response should include what the performance is inspired by, as stated in the article.

refinement: The Mallarmé Chamber Players will be performing a Bach piece, inspired by the 'Worlds of M.C. Escher' exhibition, on baroque period instruments. Docent-led tours of featured works of art are offered at 1:45 pm.


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_Darren Upson, VP of Small Business Europe, Soldo advises on the benefits and cost savings with a virtual CFO joining the team_

Any business, no matter its size, should prioritise its finances. Neglecting them can make it harder to make decisions and cause serious problems further down the line. But managing a business’ finances is a job in itself and can be hard for those without prior experience or knowledge to manage it.

Enter the CFO – an essential part of many large enterprises who keep the financial side of the business running. They allocate budgets, keep on top of incomings and outgoings and generally make sure that the business is making good financial decisions. The only snag? They’re expensive, especially for small businesses.

This is where virtual CFOs come in handy. They’re outsourced, often remote, part-time CFOs who work with several businesses, helping them manage their money and imparting their knowledge. They’re a useful resource for companies that can’t afford the overhead of a full-time CFO but need their strategic knowledge and advice. They’ve become popular over the last few years, especially with organisations like The FD Centre helping businesses hire a part time Financial Director or CFO.

It’s better to get a virtual CFO before you need one, as long term financial mismanagement can cause further problems down the line. Here are some signs that your small business could benefit from the assistance of a virtual CFO.

COMPANY SPENDING SOMETIMES SPIKES

It can be hard to implement the right expenses policy for a small business. You don’t want to make it too rigid, but equally, you don’t want staff spending on anything and everything that they want. You need to enable and trust them to make necessary purchases to do their jobs, while making sure that they spend within the guidelines.

A virtual CFO can help you manage your expenses policy. They can recommend technology that helps you control your spending by settling limits on debits cards and create an expense management guideline for you to use. Businesses need to concentrate on money coming into the business, but also money going out (i.e. spending), and a virtual CFO will help to make sure you strike the right balance to stay cashflow-healthy.

YOUR BUDGET, GOALS AND FORECASTING AREN’T ADDING UP

In order to gain the trust of potential investors, startups need a thorough financial plan with a detailed budget, goals and forecasting. This is much more granular than the bigger picture business plan that CEOs tend to manage. The expertise of a virtual CFO can help ensure money is allocated to the most business-critical areas. Sales, marketing and product development are the departments that typically scale fastest in a startup, and are necessary for continued innovation, increased customer acquisition and, ultimately, turning a profit. They therefore must be given the right budget to fuel their activities – and the necessary means to spend it.

Determining how money should and shouldn’t be spent is a significant part of a business plan and as such, needs someone dedicated to it. For companies that aren’t in a position to hire a full-time CFO, a virtual CFO can provide the analysis that investors need.

YOU’RE STRUGGLING TO MAKE BUSINESS DECISIONS

Making decisions for your business is partly down to intuition and experience. But without financial data, you’ll be missing out on crucial insights that could help you to close that deal or avoid that activity that doesn’t align with your overall strategy.

Start making informed, data-driven decisions with a virtual CFO. They’ll give you expert insight into your financial health and will help you make more informed decisions that support long-term goals.

YOUR PROCESSES HAVEN’T CHANGED

Having additional clients, employees and suppliers will change the way you need to manage your finances, as they will naturally become more complex. If your processes haven’t changed, they’re likely to be out of date, they probably won’t scale, and simple tasks will be much more difficult.

Simply employing a bookkeeper might not help, either. Additional processes need to be managed accordingly, and this is where a virtual CFO comes in handy. They can advise on the right technology that you can implement to make these processes easier and will suggest ways to scale your efforts and resources.

All companies, no matter their size, need to prioritise their finances. Working with a CFO will help you understand your current financial position and give you a better idea of your growth trajectory. They’ll also point out issues that needed to be taken care of before you take the next step towards growing your company. If you can’t afford a full-time CFO, a virtual CFO could be the perfect solution for your business.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the article say about the benefits a virtual CFO brings?

answer: A virtual CFO brings expert financial knowledge and advice to help small businesses manage their finances and make more informed decisions that support long-term growth. This is helpful both when you can't afford a full-time CFO and when your current financial practices are outdated. Virtual CFOs help businesses implement the right expense policies and avoid spending beyond their means. They also help small businesses make more informed decisions for long-term success.

answer: The critical role of a virtual CFO is the ability to organize finances for small businesses that can't afford a full-time CFO. They become very useful when the spending suddenly increases, or the budgetary constraints aren't satisfied. CFOs can help in decision-making and process optimization as well.

answer: According to the article, one of the main benefits of a virtual CFO is keeping financial spending in check. A virtual CFO can help decide what expenditures are necessary to implement and where savings are possible. They can also analyse information with business and financial insights to allow companies to make informed decisions. These decisions can have a direct effect on how successful a company is long term. A virtual CFO can also help with scaling and managing processes necessary to a chaotic business.

answer: A virtual CFO can help manage companies' expenses through the processes that need to be put in place, provide data finance that's crucial for business decisions, and create an expense management guideline for CFO.

answer: A virtual CFO can help small businesses by providing expert financial insight, giving companies access to important data that are essential for informed decision making. They also help small businesses implement the right policies and processes to ensure a healthy cash flow. These services will help businesses make better decisions about where to allocate resources for maximum impact.


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If the 25-year-old is to make the World Cup for England, he will have to play regularly and the Hammers could give him that opportunity

David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window.

West Ham host the Gunners at London Stadium on Wednesday, where a hamstring problem for Aaron Ramsey could mean Wilshere making his first Premier League start of the season.

The England international has been ravaged by injury over recent years and spent a largely uneventful spell on loan at Bournemouth last season.

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Wilshere, 25, has started Arsenal's last five Europa League matches but regular top-flight action is probably required to force his way into Gareth Southgate's plans for the 2018 World Cup.

It seems Moyes would be happy to offer just that.

"You'd hope that if you took a player from another Premier League club it'd be much easier for him to go right into the team and play well," the West Ham manager told reporters.

[Jack Wilshere Arsenal 2017]

"Jack Wilshere would be someone who we'd have to look at if he was available.

"I do believe the transfer window could be the difference between relegation and staying up. If we can get the right players, that's the big part of it.

"I also want to make sure we're looking at players who've got time and who can be at the club for a long period and not just in for a short period.

"Then there's also the short-term fix for me which is, how do we get enough wins between now and the end of the season? There's a balance between that."

Moyes claimed his first win as West Ham boss with a surprise 1-0 triumph over champions Chelsea at the weekend, although they remain in the Premier League relegation zone.

question: Who would David Moyes like to bring back?

answer: Jack Wilshere.

text: "David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window." is evidence that Moyes wants to bring Wilshere to West Ham.

answer: Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham

text: "David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window." is evidence that Moyes wants to bring Wilshere to West Ham.

answer: David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window.

text: "David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window." is evidence that Moyes wants to bring Wilshere to West Ham.

answer: David Moyes would like to bring back Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere.

text: "David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window." is evidence that Moyes wants to bring Wilshere to West Ham.

question: Jack Wilshere is how old?

text:
"If the 25-year-old is to make the World Cup for England, he will have to play regularly and the Hammers could give him that opportunity

David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window." is proof that Wilshere is 25 years old. Include this in the answer.

answer: 25 years old

text:
"If the 25-year-old is to make the World Cup for England, he will have to play regularly and the Hammers could give him that opportunity

David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window." is proof that Wilshere is 25 years old.

answer: 25 years old.

text:
"If the 25-year-old is to make the World Cup for England, he will have to play regularly and the Hammers could give him that opportunity

David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window." is proof that Wilshere is 25 years old.

answer: 25

text:
"If the 25-year-old is to make the World Cup for England, he will have to play regularly and the Hammers could give him that opportunity

David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window." is proof that Wilshere is 25 years old.

question: What has Wilshere done in the last five Europa League matches?

answer: He has started the last five Europa League matches

text: "Wilshere, 25, has started Arsenal's last five Europa League matches but regular top-flight action is probably required to force his way into Gareth Southgate's plans for the 2018 World Cup." is evidence that he started in the last 5 Europa League matches.

answer: According to the passage, Wilshere has started in the last five Europa League matches for Arsenal.

text: "Wilshere, 25, has started Arsenal's last five Europa League matches but regular top-flight action is probably required to force his way into Gareth Southgate's plans for the 2018 World Cup." is evidence that he started in the last 5 Europa League matches.

text: "Wilshere, 25, has started Arsenal's last five Europa League matches but regular top-flight action is probably required to force his way into Gareth Southgate's plans for the 2018 World Cup." is evidence that he started in the last 5 Europa League matches. Include this in the answer.

refinement: He started the last five Europa League matches for Arsenal.

answer: He has started all of them.

text: "Wilshere, 25, has started Arsenal's last five Europa League matches but regular top-flight action is probably required to force his way into Gareth Southgate's plans for the 2018 World Cup." is evidence that he started in the last 5 Europa League matches.

question: What could the transfer window of players mean?

answer: It could mean the difference between relegation and staying up in the game.

text: "Jack Wilshere would be someone who we'd have to look at if he was available." is Moyes' words regarding the possibilities surrounding Wilshere. He will be checking Wilshere's availability to see if there is an opportunity to move to West Ham.

refinement: It could mean the difference between relegation and staying up in the game. It might also offer the opportunity for Wilshere to move to West Ham, depending on his availability.

text: "I do believe the transfer window could be the difference between relegation and staying up. If we can get the right players, that's the big part of it." is Moyes's words regarding the transfer window and the impact it could have on West Ham's season.

answer: The transfer window could mean a chance for West Ham to improve their squad and potentially move away from the relegation zone. It could also mean that players like Jack Wilshere could be available for purchase.

text: "I do believe the transfer window could be the difference between relegation and staying up. If we can get the right players, that's the big part of it." is Moyes's words regarding the transfer window and the impact it could have on West Ham's season.

text: "Jack Wilshere would be someone who we'd have to look at if he was available." is Moyes' words regarding the possibilities surrounding Wilshere.

answer: The transfer window could mean the difference between relegation and staying up.

text: "Jack Wilshere would be someone who we'd have to look at if he was available." is Moyes' words regarding the possibilities surrounding Wilshere. He will be checking Wilshere's availability to see if there is an opportunity to move to West Ham.

refinement: The transfer window could mean the difference between relegation and staying up. It might also offer the opportunity for Wilshere to move to West Ham, depending on his availability.

text: "I do believe the transfer window could be the difference between relegation and staying up. If we can get the right players, that's the big part of it." is Moyes's words regarding the transfer window and the impact it could have on West Ham's season.

answer: It could mean the difference between relegation and staying up.

text: "Jack Wilshere would be someone who we'd have to look at if he was available." is Moyes' words regarding the possibilities surrounding Wilshere. He will be checking Wilshere's availability to see if there is an opportunity to move to West Ham.

refinement: It could mean the difference between relegation and staying up. It might also offer the opportunity for Wilshere to move to West Ham, depending on his availability.

text: "I do believe the transfer window could be the difference between relegation and staying up. If we can get the right players, that's the big part of it." is Moyes's words regarding the transfer window and the impact it could have on West Ham's season.

question: Write a ~1 sentence summary.

answer: David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window.

text: "David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window." is evidence of Moyes' intentions.

answer: West Ham manager David Moyes says that Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere is someone he would like to bring to the club during the January transfer window. Moyes believes that Wilshere could be key in helping the Hammers avoid relegation.

text: "David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window." is evidence of Moyes' intentions.

text:
"It seems Moyes would be happy to offer just that.

"You'd hope that if you took a player from another Premier League club it'd be much easier for him to go right into the team and play well," the West Ham manager told reporters." is proof that Moyes is the West Ham manager.

text: "I do believe the transfer window could be the difference between relegation and staying up. If we can get the right players, that's the big part of it." is Moyes' words regarding the impact Wilshere could have on West Ham's relegation.

answer: The article is about David Moyes wanting to bring Jack Wilshere to West Ham.

text: "David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window." is evidence that Moyes wants to Wilshere to West Ham.

answer: Sports talk is discussed as the transfer window is coming up, and Jack Wilshere is hot commodity.

text: "David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window." is evidence of Moyes' intentions during the upcoming transfer window. Update the first part of the answer to reflect the fact that Moyes wants Wilshere to be made available to move to West Ham.

refinement: David Moyes wants to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window. Jack Wilshere is hot commodity.

text:
"It seems Moyes would be happy to offer just that.

"You'd hope that if you took a player from another Premier League club it'd be much easier for him to go right into the team and play well," the West Ham manager told reporters." is proof that Moyes is the manager of West Ham. Give this context at the start of the answer.

refinement: West Ham manager David Moyes wants to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window. Jack Wilshere is hot commodity.

text: "I do believe the transfer window could be the difference between relegation and staying up. If we can get the right players, that's the big part of it." is Moyes' view regarding the impact the transfer window could have on his team's relegation. Include this as a second sentence to explain the importance of the transfer window.

refinement: West Ham manager David Moyes wants to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window. Jack Wilshere could help West ham avoid relegation.

text: "David Moyes would like to bring Arsenal midfielder Jack Wilshere to West Ham during the January transfer window." is evidence that Moyes wants to Wilshere to West Ham.

text: "Wilshere, 25, has started Arsenal's last five Europa League matches but regular top-flight action is probably required to force his way into Gareth Southgate's plans for the 2018 World Cup." is evidence that Jack Wilshere is a hot commodity.


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***Down towards the bottom, into the deep.***

Down towards the bottom, there laid a man. Impaled by the thought of seeing the man he has become.

Down towards the bottom, a blind man waits for a friend. His friend was killed in '83.

Down towards the bottom, a boy of 16 waits for the train. This train was not for riding.

Down towards the bottom, a wife of a soldier waits by the phone. Her husband died in a car-bombing, yet she is to know.

Down towards the bottom, a middle-aged man scowls. The thought of being with these people disgust him; vice-versa for the others.

Down towards the bottom, a 4 y.o. girl cries. Her favorite plush animal stolen from her hands.

Down towards the bottom, I watch as these people clamber for the chance at a misshapen ray of sunlight, bending its way down from the heavens. Nothing is to stop these people from their way, whether it be something simple (A plush animal) or something harsh (A husband gone away).

Down towards the bottom, I see the mercy of the light come down, illuminating the darkness of the bottom. The people come out of their caves, reminded of their old days.

Down towards the bottom, I see the boy being pulled up by a horde of teenagers. The change in face of the boy is drastic. A face of shame goes to surprise, as strangers to himself raise him from the depths of the bottom.

Down towards the bottom, a wife is reminded of something else. A child screams for help, at the mercy of a skinned knee. She is propelled from the bottom, saving the child from infection, as her husband served her nation.

Down towards the bottom, the blind man stands up and climbs the cliffside. The sudden ping of realization giving sight to his life. His friend long passed watches him as he climbs the rocky scale.

Down towards the bottom, a girl is befriended by a man. The girl, as the fun of material possessions leaves her body, grabs the man's suit. The man, as his coattails are pulled, stands up and puts the girl on his shoulder. They hitch a ride on a stray beam of light and it carries them upwards.

Down towards the bottom, a man is uplifted. His wife shows her head from behind a rock, inviting him to dinner. Your son has missed you, she says. I know, says the man.

Down towards the bottom, light makes its way down. projecting more lost souls. These people have different problems, independent from the rest. Soon these people will find their way towards the light, but for now they rest down towards the bottom, into the deep.

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Hi,

I'm MoodyAtom. This is my first time posting in this sub.

I want to tell you a little bit about this story. It is a more story-driven approach to a lecture I was given by my psychologist. I have had depression for most of my life, suicide having been a very real thing. The point of the story is to tell, though cliche, it does get better. The theme is based on the Pearl Jam song "Deep" from their album "Ten".

Also, any critique is welcome. I, according to english teachers and psychologists I've had, have always said I'm a good writer, but I would like input from actual writers.

Thank you!

*MoodyAtom*.

title: Down towards the bottom, into the deep. - Please critique.

question: What is the story about?

answer: It's about people in desperate situations finding something to hold onto, even if it seems small.

answer: The story is about a group of lost souls at the bottom of the world, and what the chance of reaching the top will do for them. The man at the bottom of the story watches as the ray of sunlight persists, and as people clamber to reach it. As the story moves on, it becomes clear that this ray of light is something people need- it embodies hope.

text: "a man at the bottom of the story" is awkward and inaccurate. This part of the story is towards the middle and it is told by the narrator.

refinement: The story is about a group of lost souls at the bottom of the world, and what the chance of reaching the top will do for them. The narrator watches as the ray of sunlight persists, and as people clamber to reach it. As the story moves on, it becomes clear that this ray of light is something people need- it embodies hope.

text: It would be better to change "the ray of sunlight" to "a ray of sunlight" since it hasn't been referenced in the response before that.

refinement: The story is about a group of lost souls at the bottom of the world, and what the chance of reaching the top will do for them. The narrator watches as a ray of sunlight persists, and as people clamber to reach it. As the story moves on, it becomes clear that this ray of light is something people need- it embodies hope.

text: "at the bottom of the world" isn't said in the story, so it would be more accurate to omit it "of the world". "at the bottom of the world" references a setting that isn't there in the story.

refinement: The story is about a group of lost souls at the bottom, and what the chance of reaching the top will do for them. The narrator watches as a ray of sunlight persists, and as people clamber to reach it. As the story moves on, it becomes clear that this ray of light is something people need- it embodies hope.

text: Blank response.

refinement: This story is about those who are down and out to varying degrees, and how even a small amount of hope can help drag them out of it.

question: What happens to the lonely wife?

answer: The wife becomes consumed with guilt over her husband's death.

text: It is false to say the wife feels guilt. In the text, it doesn't seem she knows about the death of her husband yet.

refinement: The wife waits to hear news about her soldier husband. She is propelled from that desperate moment when she decides to help an injured child.

answer: The lonely wife gets a great sense of relief when her husband returns and they walk together.

text: The story never mentions that the wife is lonely, so that is false.

refinement: The wife gets a great sense of relief when her husband returns and they walk together.

text: The response is false. The wife never feels a sense of relief because her husband doesn't come home, which also means they do not walk together.

refinement: The wife gets a great sense of relief when her husband returns and they walk together.

answer: Her husband dies in war, but she finds hope in focusing on her small child.

text: The text does not confirm if the child is the wife's. The child is only labeled as "a child".

refinement: Her husband dies in war, but she finds hope in focusing on a small child.

text: It isn't confirmed if the woman knows her husband has died, so it would be safer to say that she's waiting to here his fate.

refinement: She waits to hear the fate of her soldier husband, but she finds hope in focusing on a small child.

question: What happens to the little girl?

answer: The little girl has lost her favorite toy and the man is above her, looking down. The man is able to rescue the girl.

text: It's false that the man is looking down from above at the girl. He notices her.

refinement: The little girl has lost her favorite toy. A man notices her when she tugs on his coattails, and is able to rescue her.

answer: Her toy is stolen, but later, a man makes her happy by playing with her and putting her on his shoulder.

text: It doesn't seem that that the two are playing in the story. It would be more accurate to say that the man rescues the girl.

refinement: Her toy is stolen, but later, a man makes her happy by by putting her on his shoulder and rescuing her.

text: It would be more accurate to say that the man rescues the girl from the pits of despair as opposed to "making her happy".

refinement: Her toy is stolen, but later, a man puts her on his shoulder and rescuing her from the pits of despair.

answer: The little girl dies.

text: This is false, the story says the girl and a man rise out of the depths of the bottom.

question: What is the inspiration for the title?

answer: The inspiration for the title is the Pearl Jam song "Deep" regarding the idea of struggling but eventually making it out of a difficult situation at the 'bottom'.

answer: A song by Pearl Jam called Deep.

answer: The inspiration for the title is the Pearl Jam song "Deep" from the album "Ten." The story looks at the hopelessness that many people feel as they descend into a dark place; however, it ultimately projects light and hope onto these downtrodden individuals.

text: "The story looks at the hopelessness that many people feel as they descend into a dark place; however, it ultimately projects light and hope onto these downtrodden individuals" does not help answer the question. This sentence describes the story, not the inspiration.

refinement: The inspiration for the title is the Pearl Jam song "Deep" from the album "Ten."

question: Write a ~1 sentence summary.

answer: This work is a first-ever posting by author MoodyAtom, who is looking for critique of his work.

text: This response doesn't described the story at all.

refinement: MoodyAtom's story describes those who are stuck in desperate situations to varying degrees, but can be taken out of them by even the smallest amount of hope.

answer: The author lists people stuck in negative cycles in his town who will be uplifted by the appearance of the light.

text: It is inaccurate to say that these are people from the author's town. It's not mentioned in the story.

refinement: The author lists people stuck in negative cycles  who will be uplifted by the appearance of the light.

text: To say "describe" would be more accurate than "lists".

refinement: The author describes people stuck in negative cycles  who will be uplifted by the appearance of the light.

text: To describe the "appearance of light" as "hope", would summarize the story better. Hope is one of the main lessons from the story.

refinement: The author describes people stuck in negative cycles who will be uplifted by hope.

answer: The passage describes various individuals and their struggles and sadness.

text: This response a major part of the story: hope.

refinement: The passage describes various individuals and their struggles and sadness, and how they can be lifted up by even the smallest amount of hope.

text: It's omitted that most of these people are stuck in these struggles/in a pit of despair.

refinement: The passage describes various individuals and how they can be stuck in their pits of despair, but lifted up by even the smallest amount of hope.

answer: A depressed writer is being asked to critique a short story about depression by posting it to Reddit English.

text: It would be more accurate to say the writer has depression.

refinement: A writer who struggles with depression is being asked to critique a short story about depression by posting it to Reddit English.

text: This is overtly false, and does not describe the story. The writer wasn't asked to critique a short story, and there is no mention of Reddit English in the post.

refinement: MoodyAtom's story describes those who are stuck in desperate situations to varying degrees, but can be taken out of them by even the smallest amount of hope.

answer: The text is a short story about ordinary people in desperate situations who, at long last, manage to find something to hold onto, to continue their life.

text: There doesn't need to be a comma after "hold onto".

refinement: The text is a short story about ordinary people in desperate situations who, at long last, manage to find something to hold onto to continue their life.

text: "at long last" doesn't seem particularly accurate because it's not clear how long the people are in despair for.

refinement: The text is a short story about ordinary people in desperate situations who manage to find something to hold onto to continue their life.

answer: The author posts their story on the sub for critique.

text: This response does not summarize the story.

refinement: MoodyAtom's story describes those who are stuck in desperate situations to varying degrees, but can be taken out of them by even the smallest amount of hope.