text:
Stepping on cracks had never been something Jim liked doing. Although he didn’t have a mother whose back would break from it, he would still avoid the cracks in the pavement on the way to work every morning. He absolutely hated going to work, but not for the reasons most of us would think. Not because his boss was a troll, literally, or because the receptionist had bucked teeth that went down past her chin (yes, again, literally), but because of many other things. Two of those things being the atrocities he would see and endure on his way to work, as well as the fact that his job was boring and required him to do nothing, literally. In the elevator up Jim awkwardly tried to avoid eye contact with the elephant in the room. He was literally an elephant, one named Marshal. He took up a lot of room everywhere he went and would make any situation astonishingly awkward with his mere presence. Think: a big blue cartoony elephant. Jim was small. At 2 feet tall (2’2” actually), he was rarely noticed by anyone. He was bold except for the center of his head, where there was a 3 inch long little orange-red patch of hair.

As Jim climbed onto his chair and sat down in front of his computer screen, he couldn’t help but think of his old appearance: 6’5 with toned skeletal muscles and a great head of wavy brown hair. Living in a world where your appearance changes very suddenly and drastically as you reach adulthood and monsters with strangely arranged faces roamed the streets, however, Jim wasn’t exactly up to the task of figuring out why his ill fate had befallen him on his 21st birthday. Jim was snapped out of his day dream by his boss, the troll with a green eye and a grotesque face that nobody could love. “Jim! Why are you day dreaming? I’m telling you, the next time I catch you doing something I will give you an official warning!” said the troll. That was Jim’s 563rd time being warned about an official warning that year and although he found it absolutely stupid that his job was to do nothing, that his boss would do nothing but shout at the employees and attempt to make them feel bad (or die from his breath), his co-workers were unbearably meek and quiet and his boss never actually gave him official warnings, he just sat there and took whatever was said to him and sank lower into his chair, weakly. Something that he did bring him some excitement, though, was that every time his boss shouted at him he would lose a few hairs. Also, every time Marshal his elephant coworker made things awkward for everybody he would become slightly more elephant and awkward looking. Also, every time his boss was a/an (insert insulting term here) to anyone he would become slightly harder to look at and smell worse.

On the way home from work, Jim was attacked 6 times by 6 different people who didn’t really look like people. He also saw 5 murders by monstrous looking people on other monstrous looking people. All this was becoming a daily part of his life, despite the profound impact it initially had on him, and everything seemed to only get worse around him; People got uglier, people got meaner, Jim became smaller and lost more hair. Everything was deteriorating.

As Jim turned the key in the lock of his front door he saw, out of the corner of his eye, a large man approaching him rapidly. The 7’ tall zombie-looking creature slowly attempted to take a bite out of Jim’s second favorite drinking arm. On most days, Jim would have conceded and let him eat his entire arm but he was tired of being a victim. He pushed the creature off him, causing it to trip and fall into oncoming traffic where it was gruesomely hit by a car and lost its head. Jim felt a strange itch on the top of his head, followed by a piercing hair that made its way through his scalp. This was immediately followed by intense pain in his legs and the realization that his pants weren’t long enough anymore. Jim defended himself for once in his life, grew a few inches and grew a hair.

To the reader:
If you have read this far, then thank you. This is an experimental story I wrote in this obscure genre. I was trying to use the strange appearances of all the characters to represent their bad character traits. Essentially, in the story, the characters take on the appearance of their bad personality traits which tend to get worse because of the human tendency to give up when things are bad instead of changing.

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title: A story i wrote highlighting a problem in human society. Hope you enjoy

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about Jim?

answer: Jim always feels small and unattractive. He finds it a relief when his boss is mean to him because he won't be mocked anymore. Jim has no friends and finds his job boring and requires him to do nothing.

text: Jim is physically small, measuring 2'2", with a small patch of red hair. His appearance changed suddenly when he became 21. Every time he was mocked he became smaller. Include the change in his appearance in the response.

refinement: Jim is small with a small patch of hair, his appearance changed suddenly when he became 21. Every time he was mocked he became smaller. He finds it a relief when his boss is mean to him because he won't be mocked anymore. Jim has no friends and finds his job boring and requires him to do nothing.

text: Change the wording of the last sentence to say that Jim's job is to do nothing and he absolutely hated going to work..

refinement: Jim is small with a small patch of hair, his appearance changed suddenly when he became 21. Every time he was mocked he became smaller. He finds it a relief when his boss is mean to him because he won't be mocked anymore. Jim's job is to do nothing and he absolutely hated going to work.

text: Every time his boss berated him, he lost a few hairs. This excited Jim. Change the wording of the sentence about his boss from 'relief' to 'excited' and include his physical reaction to his boss. Also move this sentence to the end of the response.

refinement: Jim is small with a small patch of hair, his appearance changed suddenly when he became 21. Every time he was mocked he became smaller.  Jim's job is to do nothing and he hates it. He finds it exciting when his boss is mean to him because he loses a few hairs every time.

text: Jim was attacked 6 times by 6 different people on his way home. The seventh time Jim defended himself and grew a little as a result. Include this conclusion in the response.

refinement: Jim is small with a small patch of hair, his appearance changed suddenly when he became 21. Every time he was mocked he became smaller.  Jim's job is to do nothing and he hates it. He finds it exciting when his boss is mean to him because he loses a few hairs every time. Jim was attacked 6 times by 6 different people on his way home. The seventh time Jim defended himself and grew a little as a result.

answer: Jim used to be 6'5" but he got smaller when he reached adulthood. Now, he doesn't like his job where he does nothing because his boss does nothing but shout at people. He used to be very muscular but lately everything has been getting uglier and meaner around him.

text: Change the wording in the second sentence to say that his job is to do nothing.

refinement: Jim used to be 6'5" but he got smaller when he reached adulthood. Now, he doesn't like his job where he has to do nothing and his boss shouts at people to ensure they do nothing. He used to be very muscular but lately everything has been getting uglier and meaner around him.

text: Combine the first and last sentences of the response and include the reason for the change in Jim's appearance. He just sat there and took whatever was said to him and sank lower into his chair weekly, even losing a few hairs.

refinement: Jim used to be 6'5" and muscular but he got smaller when he reached adulthood because he stopped defending himself, growing smaller and losing hair every time he was berated. Now, he doesn't like his job where he has to do nothing and his boss shouts at people to ensure they do nothing.

text: Jim was attacked when opening his front door and, instead of backing off, he fought back. After the altercation he grew a bit taller and sprouted a new hair. Include this windup in the response.

refinement: Jim used to be 6'5" and muscular but he got smaller when he reached adulthood because he stopped defending himself, growing smaller and losing hair every time he was berated. Now, he doesn't like his job where he has to do nothing and his boss shouts at people to ensure they do nothing. Jim was attacked when opening his front door and, instead of backing off, he fought back. After the altercation he grew a bit taller and sprouted a new hair.

answer: Jim was a small man. He was 2 feet tall, but he was rarely noticed by anyone. He had a 3 inch long little orange-red patch of hair on the center of his head. He used to be 6'5 with toned skeletal muscles and a great head of wavy brown hair. He was in his early twenties. He was 21 when he turned into a 2 foot tall man. He had a bad boss and a boring job. He was attacked by people 6 times on his way home from work. He was attacked by a large zombie-looking creature.

text: When his boss shouted at him, which happened very often, Jim sank lower into his chair and lost a few more hairs. On his way home from work he was attacked 7 times, and defended himself the final time. This made him shoot up a inches and grew a few more hairs. Include the reason for his shrinking demeanor as well as what happened when he defended himself in the response.

refinement: Jim was a small man. He was 2 feet tall, but he was rarely noticed by anyone. He had a 3 inch long little orange-red patch of hair on the center of his head. He used to be 6'5 with toned skeletal muscles and a great head of wavy brown hair. He was in his early twenties. He was 21 when he turned into a 2 foot tall man. He had a bad boss and a boring job. When his boss shouted at him, which happened very often, Jim sank lower into his chair and lost a few more hairs. He was attacked by people 7 times on his way home from work, the final time by a large zombie-looking creature. He defended himself against the creature. This caused him to shoot up a few inches and grow a few more hairs.

answer: Jim works a tedious, boring job. He hated working because of his boss and his coworkers. He has a hair patch that ends just below his left ear. When he fell asleep dreaming of being taller, he woke up to find he'd regained his height.

text: Jimmy hated going to work, because of all the things he saw and because his job was doing nothing, literally. Change the sentence in the response about hate to these two reasons.

refinement: Jim works a tedious, boring job. He hated going to work because of what he saw on his way there and because his job was doing nothing, literally. He has a hair patch that ends just below his left ear. When he fell asleep dreaming of being taller, he woke up to find he'd regained his height.

text: When waking up from his daydream he found his boss screaming at him. This makes him shrink down even more, and lose more hair.

refinement: Jim works a tedious, boring job. He hated going to work because of what he saw on his way there and because his job was doing nothing, literally. He has a hair patch that ends just below his left ear. When he fell asleep dreaming of being taller, he was snapped out of his dream b his boss threatening him. This made him shrink down even more, and lose more hair.

text: Jim was attacked multiple times on his way home from work. The final time was when he was unlocking his front door. He defended himself for the first time and found that this made him a bit taller and also made new hair sprout. Include this conclusion to the story in the response.

refinement: Jim works a tedious, boring job. He hated going to work because of what he saw on his way there and because his job was doing nothing, literally. He has a hair patch that ends just below his left ear. When he fell asleep dreaming of being taller, he was snapped out of his dream b his boss threatening him. This made him shrink down even more, and lose more hair. Jim was attacked multiple times on his way home from work. The final time was when he was unlocking his front door. He defended himself for the first time and found that this made him a bit taller and also made new hair sprout.

answer: Jim always feels small and unattractive. He finds it a relief when his boss is mean to him because he won't be mocked anymore. Jim has no friends, but when he defends himself against a zombie, all of a sudden, he starts to grow and his hair gets longer. This makes the reader wonder whether he is becoming the thing he hates.

answer: Jim is a small man who works in a boring job where he does nothing. He is often bullied by his boss and his coworkers are quiet. He is not very brave. He has a small patch of orange-red hair on the center of his head.

answer: Jim was a small man. He was 2 feet tall, but he was rarely noticed by anyone. He had a 3 inch long little orange-red patch of hair on the center of his head. He used to be 6'5 with toned skeletal muscles and a great head of wavy brown hair. He was in his early twenties. He was 21 when he turned into a 2 foot tall man. He had a bad boss and a boring job. He was attacked by people 6 times on his way home from work.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about Jim's boss?

answer: Jim's boss is a troll with a green eye and a grotesque face that nobody could love. He is always shouting at the employees and attempting to make them feel bad. He also has a bad breath.

text: Every time his boss was mean to someone, he would become harder to look at and smell worse. Include this link between the boss' behavior and appearance in the response.

refinement: Jim's boss is a troll with a green eye and a grotesque face that nobody could love. He is always shouting at the employees and attempting to make them feel bad. He also has a bad breath. Every time his boss was mean to someone, he would become harder to look at and smell worse.

answer: While Jim does not understand why he's having a bad day or bad month, or why his appearance seems to get worse each day he goes to work with the trolls, he can identify specific things about his job that cause his agony. In the most frustrating way, his boss is nothing. He is a troll but why that sounds insulting, his heart is obviously just not in the work being done. Instead, the troll often lets Jim, who would prefer to be at home sleeping, do nothing while ignoring him other than to dare him to take promotion in a threatening way. The troll, rude and foul-smelling all the time, chastises everyone else in the office who, in comparison to Jim, are unexceptional but the troll is so taken by Jim's genuine kindness and humility that they simply don't notice it. Jim's co-workers are mostly quiet, their features and expressions are indistinguishable.

text: Remove the first part of the response, it is not correct and does not speak to the text.

refinement: The troll, rude and foul-smelling all the time, chastises everyone else in the office who, in comparison to Jim, are unexceptional but the troll is so taken by Jim's genuine kindness and humility that they simply don't notice it. Jim's co-workers are mostly quiet, their features and expressions are indistinguishable.

text: Jim's boss is a troll who chastises everyone in the office to ensure that they are doing nothing as they should. He threatens to issue warnings to them, but never follows through. Every time he is mean to his employees he grows a bit uglier and smells worse. Change the wording and include the link between Jim's boss' appearance and his behavior.

refinement: Jim's boss is a troll, rude and foul-smelling all the time, he chastises everyone in the office to ensure that they are doing nothing. He threatens to issue warnings to them, but never follows through. Every time he is mean to his employees he grows a bit uglier and smells worse. Jim's co-workers are mostly quiet, their features and expressions are indistinguishable.

answer: Jim's boss speaks to the receptionist but Jim is there because he daydreaming or hasn't noticed him approaching. His boss always shout at the employees and when he encounters Jim, he yells at him even though Jim is just sitting there, taking whatever is said. He believes Jim to have done something that warrants an official warning, which Jim hasn't done yet.

text: Jim's boss is a troll with a green eye and a grotesque face. Every time he is mean to his employees, he looks and smells worse. Include Jim's boss' appearance in the response as well as its link with his behavior.

refinement: Jim's boss is a troll with a green eye and a grotesque face. Every time he is mean to his employees, he looks and smells worse. Jim's boss speaks to the receptionist but Jim is there because he daydreaming or hasn't noticed him approaching. His boss always shout at the employees and when he encounters Jim, he yells at him even though Jim is just sitting there, taking whatever is said. He believes Jim to have done something that warrants an official warning, which Jim hasn't done yet.

text: Rewrite the second part of the response to remove duplication and to clarify that Jim's boss is admonishing him for doing something (daydreaming) where he should be doing nothing.

refinement: Jim's boss is a troll with a green eye and a grotesque face. Every time he is mean to his employees, he looks and smells worse. Jim's boss speaks to the receptionist but Jim is there because he daydreaming or hasn't noticed him approaching. His boss always shout at the employees and when he encounters Jim, he yells at him for doing something where he should be doing nothing. He threatens Jim with an official warning, but does not follow through.

answer: While Jim does not understand why he's having a bad day or bad month, or why his appearance seems to get worse each day he goes to work with the trolls, he can identify specific things about his job that cause his agony. His boss Allan, a troll, often lets Jim, who would prefer to be at home sleeping, do nothing while ignoring him other than to dare him to take promotion in a threatening way. Allan, rude and foul-smelling all the time, chastises everyone else in the office who, in comparison to Jim, are unexceptional but the troll is so taken by Jim's genuine kindness and humility that they simply don't notice it. Jim's co-workers are mostly quiet, their features and expressions are indistinguishable.

answer: Jim's boss is a troll with a green eye and a grotesque face. He has a habit of shouting at the employees and attempting to make them feel bad. He doesn't actually give Jim official warnings, but he just sits there and takes whatever is said to him.

text: He threatens to give Jim a warning for the 563rd time, but does not follow through. Change the wording to reflect that Jim's boss hold threats of official warnings over his employees' heads but never follows through because his employees back off.

refinement: Jim's boss is a troll with a green eye and a grotesque face. He has a habit of shouting at the employees and attempting to make them feel bad. He doesn't actually give Jim official warnings, although threatening him with it multiple times.

text: Every time Jim's boss is mean to someone he becomes uglier and smells worse. Include this link between Jim's boss' appearance and his behavior in the response.

refinement: Jim's boss is a troll with a green eye and a grotesque face. He has a habit of shouting at the employees and attempting to make them feel bad. He doesn't actually give Jim official warnings, although threatening him with it multiple times. Every time Jim's boss is mean to someone he becomes uglier and smells worse.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about Jim's family?

answer: Jim has a mother whose back would break from stepping on cracks.

text: Remove the current response, it is not correct.

text: The text does not say anything about Jim's family. Change the response to 'No Answer'.

answer: No answer

answer: No answer

answer: No answer

answer: No answer

answer: No answer


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text:
[peace of mind]

It’s the goal for most adults: peace of mind. So often we find ourselves trapped in a hurricane of deadlines, issues, bills, and personal anxieties, to the point that the only choice is to keep struggling through the hurricane or break down, and the latter isn’t much of an option.

We think of the idea of peace as this far-off destination that requires a struggle to reach. “If I just buckle down and get through this, I’ll find peace eventually,” we tell ourselves.

But peace isn’t a place we have to reach. Peace is a state of mind that we can adopt right now, as long as we know what to do.

Even in the toughest and most stressful times, peace is just a state-of-mind shift away.

Here are 40 ways you can better shift into that perfect peace of mind at will:

SOLITUDE

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1.  LOVE YOURSELF. Be the best friend you always wanted. Talk to yourself, share your thoughts and anxieties and wishes with yourself. You might discover something new.
2.  POSITIVE AFFIRMATIONS. Repeat those soft but smart positive affirmations that give you a sense of power and presence.
3.  CONNECT WITH NATURE. Give yourself time every week to sit beside a tree or hike up a mountain.
4.  GIVE YOURSELF A YOU DATE. No one else, just you. Watch a movie, go to a restaurant, buy some clothes. Do what you want to do.
5.  READ A BOOK. Action, adventure, self-help. Anything. Just give yourself that experience.

ACTIVITY

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_FEEL LIKE YOU'RE STUCK IN A RUT? TIRED OF NOT FINDING DEEP AND MEANINGFUL RELATIONSHIPS IN LIFE? LEARN A POWERFUL FRAMEWORK FOR ALIGNING YOUR SPIRITUALITY, WORK, FAMILY AND LOVE AROUND YOUR TRUE NATURE FROM A MODERN DAY SHAMAN. LEARN MORE HERE._

1.  CLEAN UP. There’s a part of your home that you haven’t touched in _years. _Clean it up.
2.  STRETCH. Reconnect with your body. Spend 5 to 10 minutes a day just stretching. You’ll be surprised how stiff you’ve become.
3.  GO OUT. Ride a bike, get in the car, or hop on the train—see the scenery and take it all in.
4.  WALK ON THE BEACH. We don’t all live next to the beach, but whenever you can, give it a shot. The fresh ocean air and the sand in your toes is always a refreshing experience.
5.  DANCE. Let the music sink into you, and let your body respond naturally.

COMMUNICATION

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1.  APOLOGIZE AND FORGIVE. If you made a mistake, don’t hold it over yourself. Apologize to yourself and forgive.
2.  LET GO OF A GRUDGE. Any grudge, no matter how old. Call them up and let them know you want to move on.
3.  LET IT OUT. If someone frustrates or annoys you, let them know about it. Don’t hold it in.
4.  WRITE WHAT YOU LEARN. When you go through a weird or tough situation, write down what you’ve learned and study it. This deepens the lesson.
5.  BURN YOUR WEIGHT. All the anxieties and issues holding you down? Write it down and burn the paper. Tell your brain that these things are nothing.

CONTRIBUTION

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1.  SERVE OTHERS. Serve those around you because you want to, not because you are being paid to.
2.  HELP OTHERS WITH YOUR TALENTS. If you have certain skills or talents, figure out ways to share those skills to the community.
3.  UNCONDITIONAL KINDNESS. Learn to help other people without worrying what you will get back from it.
4.  VOLUNTEER WITH ANIMALS. Is there a nearby animal shelter? Go volunteer; you will love it.
5.  HELP CHARITIES. Choose one with an advocacy you believe in.

ACCEPTANCE

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1.  DON’T JUDGE YOURSELF. Don’t say “I should/shouldn’t have.” Instead, say, “I did my best, I’ll be better next time.”
2.  APPRECIATE OTHERS. It can be easy to try to make those around us perfect instead of adapting to them ourselves.
3.  APPRECIATE YOURSELF. Write a list—things you like about you. Make it as long as you can.
4.  ENJOY THE PRESENT. Take time every day to smile and enjoy the now, instead of always building for the future.
5.  BE COMPASSIONATE. Even if others have wronged you in the past, try to look at life in their shoes and understand their issues.

CREATIVITY

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1.  BLOG. Write your thoughts, your goals, your ideas.
2.  WALK AND PHOTOGRAPH. You don’t have to be a pro to take pictures. Go around the neighborhood and photograph the pretty things you see.
3.  MEDITATE. Get a quote that you love, sit down, and think about it.
4.  PEACE COLLAGE. Create a collage of pictures that give you a sense of peace and satisfaction.
5.  ART THERAPY. Reconnect with art, even if you haven’t touched it in years. Paint, crayons, pens—put your colors to paper.

MEDITATION

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1.  BREATHE THROUGH ALTERNATE NOSTRILS. It might sound unusual, but it helps you become more intimate with your breathing. Hold down one nostril and inhale through the other, then reverse.
2.  GUIDED MEDITATION. If you don’t want to go to a class, then try a YouTube video that will guide you into meditation.
3.  SLOW WALK. Take a slow walk around the block, absorbing everything from the motions of your body to the feeling of the earth under your feet.
4.  BREATHE A HUNDRED TIMES WHILE COUNTING.
5.  MEDITATE. Spend 5-10 minutes a day just sitting down to meditate.

CONNECTION

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1.  SELF-CARE WITH OTHERS. Ask a friend to join you with your self-care; going out to walk or to a gym session.
2.  FIND FRIENDS ONLINE. You can find everything on the Internet, so find someone who can understand what you are going through.
3.  BOND WITH YOUR LOVED ONES. Take off the adult stress for a day and invite your best friend or loved one to a fun date. Be a kid again.
4.  STOP SELF-CRITICAL THOUGHTS. Stop blaming yourself or those around you.
5.  BE TRUTHFUL. Never tell a lie in your relationships; it only serves to weigh you down.

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question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the suggested methods that have to do with walking.

answer: One suggested method is for a hike up a mountain. Another method suggests walking on the beach. Yet another method suggests walking around the neighborhood and taking pictures. Finally, taking a slow walk is suggested as a form of meditation.

answer:
1. Walk on the beach
2. Walk on the beach
2. Bird-watch with a friend or relative
4. Ride a bike or hop on a train; see the scenery
5. Daydream by the road on your way to work

text: The response mostly mentions incorrect methods. Only one method that involves walking is mentioned from the text.

refinement:
1. Walk on the beach
2. Hike up a mountain
2. Walk and photograph
4. Slow walk to meditate

answer:
1. Spend time walking in nature.
2. Stretch every day.
3. Go for walks to see the scenery.
4. Dance.
5. Take walks to clear your mind and relax.

text: The response incorrectly mentions Dance and Stretch as methods in form of walking and misses to mention walking to photograph and walking on the beach.

refinement:
1. Spend time walking in nature.
2. Walking and photographing.
3. Go for walks to see the scenery.
4. Take walks to clear your mind and relax.

answer: The methods suggested for walking include stretching, going out and seeing the landscape, walking on the beach, dancing, and walking slowly to take in your surroundings.

text: The response mentions methods that do not involve walking.

refinement: The methods suggested for walking include, going out and seeing the landscape, walking on the beach, and walking slowly to take in your surroundings.

answer:
1. Walk on the beach. 3. Walk on the beach.

2. Ride a bike, get in the car, or hop on the train—see the scenery and take it all in. 4. Walk on the beach.

text: The response mentions a repeated method and includes methods that are not forms of walking.

refinement:
1. Walk on the beach.
2. Going for a hike
3. Slow walk to meditate
4. Walking and photographing

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the methods that cannot be done alone.

answer: The list has no items that cannot be done alone.

text: The response misses to mention methods that cannot be done alone.

refinement: Methods that cannot be done alone of connection involve: being truthful as it applies to relationships, finding friends online, and bonding with your loved ones. Methods for Communication involve: Letting go of grudges and of feelings. Methods of Contribution involve: serving others, helping others with your talents, practicing unconditional kindness, volunteering with animals and helping charities. Methods of Acceptance include appreciating others and being compassionate.

answer: One of the methods that cannot be done alone is admitting when you are wrong, forgiving others and forgiving yourself. Another method is connecting with nature, either by spending time outside or volunteering with animals. A third method is meditation, especially guided meditation. Finally, the final method is connecting with others either by finding friends online or spending quality time with loved ones.

text: The response includes information that is not useful for the task.

refinement: One of the methods that cannot be done alone is admitting when you are wrong and forgiving others. Another method is volunteering with animals. A third method is connecting with others either by finding friends online or spending quality time with loved ones.

answer: Methods for better peace of mind include prolonged solitude and communication, activity, creativity, and meditation. To foster connection, self-care should be done with others, online or in person. Self-critical thoughts are also something to work to avoid. Lastly, being truthful applies to relationships.

text: The response includes information that is not useful for the task.

refinement: Methods for better peace of mind that include connection: self-care should be done with others, online or in person. Lastly, being truthful applies to relationships.

text: The response misses to mention other methods that cannot be done alone.

refinement: Methods for better peace of mind that include connection: self-care should be done with others, online or in person. Other methods of connection involve: being truthful as it applies to relationships, finding friends online, and bonding with your loved ones. Other methods for Communication involve: Letting go of grudges and of feelings. Methods of Contribution involve: serving others, helping others with your talents, practicing unconditional kindness, volunteering with animals and helping charities. Methods of Acceptance include appreciating others and being compassionate.

answer: That there needs to be someone or something that can attest to the peace of mind. The contributor mentioned in the article recommends finding online friends for this purpose. The author doesn't state that it can't be done alone or do it alone, and the person actually has to care for themself in the sort of way that the others care for the self, so even if it can be an online friend, there has to be that missing link. Noting in the summary means that there are three things ("ask a friend to join you with your self-care; going out to walk or to a gym session. Find friends online. Bond with your loved ones") as options to fill in that missing link that was stated.

text: The response includes information that is not useful for the task.

refinement: That there needs to be someone or something that can attest to the peace of mind. The contributor mentioned in the article recommends finding online friends for this purpose. Bond with your loved ones as options to fill in that missing link that was stated.

text: The response misses to mention other methods that cannot be done alone.

refinement: That there needs to be someone or something that can attest to the peace of mind. The contributor mentioned in the article recommends finding online friends for this purpose. Bond with your loved ones as options to fill in that missing link that was stated. Other methods of connection involve: being truthful as it applies to relationships. Other methods for Communication involve: Letting go of grudges and feelings. Methods of Contribution involve: serving others, helping others with your talents, practicing unconditional kindness, volunteering with animals and helping charities. Methods of Acceptance include appreciating others and being compassionate.

answer: Serving others requires interacting with other people. Helping others with your talents does as well. Showing unconditional kindness and volunteering with animals also involve others. Appreciating others does as well. All of the suggestions under connection involve other people as well, except for stopping self-critical thoughts.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the methods for attaining peace of mind that involve money.

answer: 40 ways to promote peace of mind include activities and communication, as well as meditation and creativity. In addition, there are several methods for attaining peace of mind that involve money, such as donating to charities, volunteering, and spending money on self-care.

text: The response misses to mention that money is not directly involved with attaining peace of mind, however it is possible depending on the action.

refinement: There are several methods for attaining peace of mind that might possibly involve money, such as donating to charities, and spending money on self-care.

answer: One of the methods mentioned is to find whales. One way to do this is buying a fishing boat. This is implemented with the help of a budgeter.

text: The response misses to mention that most methods for attaining peace do not involve money.

refinement: No method to attain peace of mind involves money.

answer: Giving yourself a date possibly involves spending money. Helping a charity could possibly involve donating money.

answer: No methods for attaining peace of mind involve money.

answer: To attain peace of mind, you can use activities such as meditation, creativity, and connection with others. The other method for attaining peace of mind is to use activities that involve money. These include apologizing and forgiving grudges, helping charitie$, volunteering with animals, and donating to charities.

text: The response misses to mention that most methods for attaining peace do not involve money.

refinement: To attain peace of mind, no method involves money.


text:
_By Annie Aggarwal_

_Photography: Courtesy World Wide Web_

_READ TIME: 1 MIN 30 SECS_

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Have your needs outdone your space? Or are you just plain bored with the way your spaces look and feel? Basically, do you feel the strong urge to redecorate but don’t know how? Check out what we have in store for you…

‘Uplift the humdrum areas of your home into enriching everyday spaces’ is no longer easier said than done. Whilst choices are aplenty, especially with internet baffling you with supposedly ‘new’ designs, a little pragmatic assistance can go a long way in picking furniture, floors and walls to create spaces that reflect individual aesthetic sensibilities.

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We are surrounded by countless choices - some chic, some rustic, some pop and yet others subtle and elegant! Here’s how we can narrow them down:

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COLOUR: Throw a splash of colour using accent pieces, pillows, or paint on a wall, amidst subtle investment furniture. And you have a room fresh as new. __

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TEXTURE adds to the feel of a space. An exterior surface finish can give an organic feel to your interiors, while adding sleek, smooth-finish metallic furniture can lend that touch of sophistication. Mixing a variety of materials – glass and acrylic with exotic woods, can give the space a dimension of eclectic.

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You can always count on FABRICS to add the warmth and comfort you crave in your rooms.  A plush oversized chair or a restful couch can account for a functional makeover of a space. Play with rich drapes and luxurious upholstery to create a more formal setting.

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LIGHTING can effectively highlight or understate. With the variety of lighting options available, the fixtures themselves may act as central focal pieces or they may be subtle, drawing attention to a particularly interesting corner.

The smallest details have the potential to add significant character. A traveller’s home can be an ode to his adventures, a collector’s passion may reflect on his walls, adorned with rare pieces, and a nature enthusiast’s living space can sport a fresh green tinge and flowers changing with the seasons.

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A piece of ART here, a bit of ACCESSORY there, can add intrigue and interest to an otherwise mundane space.

All these elements in harmony with each other can create inspired areas. Possibilities are endless. The best path to choose is the one that leads you to a space you would be delighted to call your own.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize how you can narrow down a style.

answer: At first, there are limitless choices. In simplifying your choices, trim down your options to organic and geometric styles, and then something in for colour.

text: The answer is insufficient and doesn't summarize the options listed in the text. The model should consider doing this.

refinement: At first, there are limitless choices. First, try throwing a splash of color using colorful pillows, accent pieces, or even paint on the wall to simplify your options. Next, you can also make use of texture the right way to give an organic finish to your interiors. Also, use fabrics to give your space some warmth and comfort. Finally, consider using lighting to draw attention, highlight, or understate exciting items in your house.

answer: According to the narrator, you can add colour via accent pieces, pillows or paint on a wall. A twist on the look can be added by blending textures, while fabric at home can add the warmth and comfort you crave. A traveller's home can be an ode to his adventures, while a collector's passion can be revealed on his walls. There is plenty one can choose from to set a space to suit their personality.

text: The answer omits using lighting to draw attention, understate or highlight something interesting in the corner.

refinement: According to the narrator, you can add color via accent pieces, pillows, or paint on a wall. A twist on the look can be added by blending textures, while fabric at home can add the warmth and comfort you crave. You can also use lighting to draw attention, highlight, or understate an interesting item in the corner of your house. A traveler's home can be an ode to his adventures, while a collector's passion can be revealed on his walls. There is plenty one can choose from to set a space to suit their personality.

text: The last sentence contains a grammatical error. It's supposed to be 'there are..' not 'there is...' The model should consider correcting this.

refinement: According to the narrator, you can add color via accent pieces, pillows, or paint on a wall. A twist on the look can be added by blending textures, while fabric at home can add the warmth and comfort you crave. You can also use lighting to draw attention, highlight, or understate an exciting item in the corner of your house. A traveler's home can be an ode to his adventures, while a collector's passion can be revealed on his walls. There are plenty one can choose from to set a space to suit their personality.

answer: You should aim to feel like you can do something great in the room. You can start with the amount of light, accent pieces, coloring, textures, styles, and fabrics. There is no wrong or right way when it comes to the style of the home. You can choose from a variety of great options. Pick what will bring you the most joy in your home.

text: The model should omit 'styles' from its answer since it's already talking about narrowing down a style.

refinement: You should aim to feel like you can do something great in the room. You can start with the amount of light, accent pieces, coloring, textures, and fabrics. There is no wrong or right way when it comes to the style of the home. You can choose from a variety of great options. Pick what will bring you the most joy in your home.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize everything relating to furniture.

answer:
Practical assistance in picking furniture, floors, and walls is recommended. Colours and textures add to the richness of a space. Throw a splash of color using accent pieces, pillows, or painted walls, alongside investment furniture. Materials like glass and acrylic with exotic woods, combined with textures like glass, fabric, metal, and other natural elements like wood can be mixed to give a space a particular dimension.
Fixtures themselves can either be central focal pieces or subtle, drawing attention to a particularly interesting corner.
Bright light can enhance or de-emphasize elements of a space. A traveller's home could be an ode to their adventures and a collector's passion could reflect on the walls. Environmental green-tinting and flowers could be used to reflect a nature person's likings. A bit of art here, a piece of accessory there, can also add a unique character. Pick and choose what fits you best and reflects your taste.
A template for a house can be found in any area with some effort and ingenuity.

text: The model's answer is all over the place and doesn't make sense on its own. It looks like the model clipped and pasted points from the text without arranging them logically. This should be rewritten.

refinement: Practical assistance can go a long way in picking out the right furniture for your space. Firstly, consider subtle investment furniture when adding color to your room. Secondly, an exterior surface finish can give an organic feel to your interiors while adding sleek smooth-finish metallic furniture. Also, mixing various glass, wood, and acrylic materials will go a long way to decorate your space. Invest in an oversized chair or comfy couch for a functional makeover of a room. Finally, the lighting fixtures will help highlight or act as a central focal piece.

answer: The text implies that furniture is the final stage after you make all of your other decisions. It references the importance of accent pieces like pillows, decorative items and furniture in a nice location in your room. "Acutely practical" describes how you should match up the furniture. Other materials are mentioned like polished metallic furniture, glass and acrylic and exotic woods.

text: The answer omits lighting as a part of furniture for a house. This should be included.

refinement: The text implies that furniture is the final stage after you make all of your other decisions. It references the importance of accent pieces like pillows, decorative items, and furniture in a lovely location in your room. "Acutely practical" describes how you should match up the furniture. Other materials are mentioned, like polished metallic furniture, glass and acrylic, and exotic woods. Finally, the lighting fixtures will help highlight or act as a central focal piece to an exciting item in the room.

answer: The text implies that furniture is the final stage after you make all of your other decisions. It references the importance of accent pieces like pillows, decorative items, and furniture in a nice location in your room. "Acutely practical" describes how you should match up the furniture. Other materials are mentioned like polished metallic furniture, glass and acrylic, and exotic woods.

answer: The article details several design styles for furniture, noting that the color, fabric and how furniture appears are three key elements to consider when furnishing a space. Throw a splash of color through accent pieces and pillows, while adding exotic woods, exotic metals, and glass and acrylic with finishes ranging from sleek, smooth finishes to more organic textures like fabric.

answer: The article details several design styles for furniture, noting that the color, fabric and the materials furniture is made of are three key elements to consider when furnishing a space. Throw a splash of color through accent pieces and pillows, while adding exotic woods, exotic metals, and glass and acrylic with finishes ranging from sleek, smooth finishes to more organic textures like fabric.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize everything relating to color.

answer: Choose a color that contrasts with the accent walls, if you are trying to make an impact. Choose a color for your accessories such as pillows, that compliments the main color scheme of your room. Bring in a splash of color using accent pieces or painting accessories. You can also invest in metallic furniture to give a room a sophisticated feel.

text: The answer should remove the last sentence because it doesn't have anything to do with color.

refinement: Choose a color that contrasts with the accent walls if you are trying to make an impact. Choose a color for your accessories, such as pillows, that compliments the main color scheme of your room. Bring in a splash of color using accent pieces or painting accessories.

answer:
Below is a list of things that should be avoided color-wise:
- Black on blue spaces if your furniture or accent color
- Colors in the pastel and floral categories if the main color of the room is blue, - Red rooms don't go well with prints, rugs, and black
- Fluorescent-bright shade in rooms with natural light
- Change your flooring fuchsia to white/gold.
- Choose a sunny yellow shade vs. coral if the main color of the room is blue

text: The information provided in the answer is not according to the text. The model either made this up or outsourced its answer. It should rewrite this.

refinement: Choose a color that contrasts with the accent walls if you are trying to make an impact. Choose a color for your accessories, such as pillows, that compliments the main color scheme of your room. Bring in a splash of color using accent pieces or painting accessories.

answer: Color can set a particular mood. Throw a splash of color using accent pieces or pillows.

answer: Lighting can bring attention to a particularly interesting corner. A traveler's home can be an ode to his adventures, a collector's passion may reflect on his walls, adorned with rare pieces, and a nature enthusiast's living space can sport a fresh green tinge. Color can set a particular mood. You can throw a splash color. Throw a splash of color using accent pieces or pillows.

text:
-The answer ought not to talk about lighting because it has nothing to do with what the text says about color. This should be removed.
-Also, the second sentence is irrelevant. This should be removed too.
-The last sentence should be rewritten because it contains a redundancy.

refinement: Color can set a particular mood. Throw a splash of color using accent pieces or pillows. Choose a color that contrasts with the accent walls if you are trying to make an impact.

answer:
Below is a list of things that should be avoided colorwise:
- Black on blue spaces if your furniture or accent color

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the text say about rugs?

answer: No answer

text: Empty response.

refinement: The text does not say anything about rugs.

answer: Nothing in the article explicitly mentions the use of a rug, but it may be implied to be a backdrop tool used to add effect to a room and can play with light and color.

answer: Rugs can help with texture, but in an abstract way.

text: The answer ought to indicate that the text does not talk about rugs.

refinement: Rugs can help with texture but in an abstract way. However, the text does not talk about rugs.

answer: No answer


text:
The bus rode along through the worst part of town, and we sat there pretending like nothing had happened. Arnie looked detached. Sometimes he would get in a mood like that, and just shut off. This time it made a lot of sense, other times it seemed out of place. Again, other times it would seem like he couldn't contain the thoughts in his head, and he'd tap his foot wildly as he talked.

"You know, it wasn't as bad as I thought it would have looked."

"Yeah, I know."

"I wish we could have helped her though. I mean before. I wish to hell we could have helped her."

"I know. Me too."

The bus driver called out the stop, and several people exited out the back door. Drops of rain water had begun collecting on the bus window, and I leaned in, squeezed one eye shut, and squinted through one of the drops. Through it, I saw an upside-down gas station, and I don't know why, but it depressed the hell out of me.

"Hand me the flask."

"Sure thing." Arnie said.

It seemed like the right thing to do, and I swigged hard, and the drink burned in my throat and chest. I didn't feel much of anything for her anymore, but I couldn't stop seeing the girl, lying there, broken on the rain covered concrete. Everyone, especially the medics, moved slowly around her, as if the whole thing had been rehearsed. A few people were taking pictures on their cell phones, and fewer people were crying. The girl couldn't have been older than twenty-five.

The bus made a hard right, hitting the curb as it turned, and Arnie looked over at me. He didn't look so detached anymore, and I was glad he was there with me.

title: A Rainy Afternoon

question: Who are the main characters?

answer: Arnie and the narrator.

answer: The main characters are Arnie and the narrator.

answer: Arnie and an unnamed protagonist

question: They "sat there pretending like nothing had happened." What does this quote refer to?

answer: They had just seen a young woman lying on the rain-covered concrete broken [seemingly dead].

text: I didn't feel much of anything for her anymore, but I couldn't stop seeing the girl, lying there, broken on the rain covered concrete.

text: No answer.

refinement: This quote refers to the narrator and Arnie looking at a girl lying motionless on the sidewalk.

text: No answer.

refinement: This quote refers to the narrator and Arnie looking at a girl lying motionless on the sidewalk.

question: Why did Arnie look detached?

answer: Arnie looked detached because he was so overcome with feelings of sadness and guilt over not being able to do anything to help the girl, even after the tragedy had already happened.

text: The passage is not entirely clear about why Arnie is looking detached, and the answer should reflect that.

refinement: Though the passage suggests that Arnie often looks detached, it can be assumed in this situation it is because he is so overcome with feelings of sadness and guilt over not being able to do anything to help the girl, even after the tragedy had already happened.

text: This quote refers to the narrator and Arnie looking at a girl lying motionless on the sidewalk.

answer: Arnie looked detached because the sight of the dead girl on the sidewalk was too difficult for him to process emotionally.

text: The passage is not entirely clear about why Arnie is looking detached, and the answer should reflect that.

refinement: Though the passage suggests that Arnie often looks detached for no particular reason, it can be assumed that in this situation, Arnie looks this way because the sight of the dead girl on the sidewalk was too difficult for him to process emotionally.

text: This quote refers to the narrator and Arnie looking at a girl lying motionless on the sidewalk.

answer: He would sometimes get in a mood like that, this time there seemed to be a reason.

text: The answer should include the specific reason why Arnie might look this way.

refinement: He would sometimes get in a mood like that; however, it appears that this time, it is because he witnessed the body of a woman laying on the sidewalk.

question: Is there resolution to a problem?

answer: no

answer: There is no closure.

answer: This quote explores if the problem has been resolved. The problem appears to be solved.

text: While the problem of the woman's body laying in the street seems to have been dealt with, the overall unease of the passage is not resolved.

refinement: The problem does not seem to have been solved.

question: Write a ~2 sentence summary.

answer: A rainy bus ride brings up the reminder of a woman who was in a bad accident. On the bus, a couple discuss how they wish they could have helped the woman before it happened.

answer: The narrator closes their eyes and imagines the bus driving through bad parts of town. They watch a young woman who has been injured and is lying on the scene.

text: The narrator does not imagine being on the bus; they are actually riding on the bus.

refinement: The narrator is on the bus driving through bad parts of town. They watch a young woman who has been injured and is lying on the scene.

text: The events involving the woman happens before the events of the passage.

refinement: The narrator is on the bus driving through bad parts of town. They ponder the woman they saw lying in the street, wishing they could have done something to help.

answer: The narrator and Arnie are on a bus. They are reflecting on their regrets about a young woman who was unable to be saved, whom they saw as they rode through the worst part of town.

text: The events involving the woman happens before the events of the passage.

refinement: The narrator and Arnie are on a bus. They are reflecting on their regrets about a young woman who was unable to be saved, whom they saw prior to getting on the bus.

answer: The narrator and Arnie are on a bus, pretending like nothing had happened. They had just seen a young woman lying on the rain-covered concrete; it seems she was dead.

answer: At some point on what is likely a rainy afternoon, two men, presumably not strangers, are riding the public bus. An image, coincidentally or not, of a gas station washes over the left side of the window.

text: The summary does not mention the woman that the narrator and Arnie saw on the sidewalk.

refinement: At some point on what is likely a rainy afternoon, two men, presumably not strangers, are riding the public bus. They both contemplate the woman who they saw laying motionless on the sidewalk.

answer: The narrator and Arnie are on the bus when they pass by a scene where someone has violated a twenty-five-year-old girl. Her body is bleeding on the concrete and it upsets the narrator.

text: It is unclear what happened to the woman.

refinement: The narrator and Arnie are on the bus when they pass by a scene where a woman is laying in the street. Her body is bleeding on the concrete and it upsets the narrator.


text:
*November 21, 2077 02:33 AM*

*Allen William Brier, 1st Class Mechanical Technician aboard the Belle Celeste.*

               Wormholes, it turns out, are real. They don’t have shape or structure like a worm, but more of a layer on another layer. Coming in or out of one? I’m not sure how that feels, possibly similar to being forced hard against a wall, turning it sideways and being thrown into an unknown oblivion. There may be paths wormholes take, but all I experienced was the ship coming out, or ‘layering’ on top of us; and the damage was extraordinary.

               I am a survivor, being outside of the ship at the time, doing repairs to an external fuel tank. I do not consider myself lucky, but how I survived the explosions and splintering metal collisions...I’ll never know. A word washes over me as I move silently through space…*walking*.

               *Walking*…that word, it makes me nauseous. I think how an amputated arm might feel; reminiscent it existed, but still no tangible way to reflect its memories. *Walking*…that word meant nothing now…swimming with a sick twist knotting my stomach and complete freedom washing over my body. The non-structure heats an intrinsic need to pull my body into a fetal position. I don’t want my limbs dangling out there, and I need to feel close to myself. I was all I had left to grasp. Arms pressed, knitted tightly across my chest, the suit wouldn’t allow them to get closer than six inches to my body, but I try to pull them close, holding them tightly; until my muscles scream at me. I refuse to let go. I try to bring my legs up to my chest and grip the slippery suit with my arms, which is no good, the suit is too bulky...so all I can muster is my knees bent and legs crossed.

               Memories leak out, of a dark tunnel in a water park, the water gushing past and my body sliding up the walls, being in a fetal position, trying to catch my breath. The feeling of nostalgia is overwhelming and I weep.

               Terrible dreams, my mind in denial…I fall asleep after my muscles give out and my arms fall apart and legs uncross. I’m dreaming I am sitting up in a bed and looking through the window, the blurriness of sleep coating my eyes. I coughed into my hand and black mucus slaps into my palm. With a grunt of disgust I rub it onto the bed sheets and stare as the blackness spreads slowly across the cotton, sinking in and then expanding and pulsing. The substance begins to pour out of the spot where I initially rubbed, and as though reaching for me, it touches my leg, very wet and very cold. All at once the bed was soaked in black, and my face twisted into horror as I sunk into it. I prop my hands on the bed and made for a small jump onto the floor…

               This is where I wake up, disoriented and my feet flailing. Sudden terror hits me, and my heart begins to spasm and race, my limbs search out for something to hold onto. There was nothing; nothing to grab or step on, kick or rest against. I was floating, and there was nothing to stop me, and nowhere to go. I was obliviously lost to myself, and swallowed up by darkness; murky, cold, oily darkness.

               My stomach bows, and I am going to be sick. My legs kick out and hyper extend, causing a burning sensation in the back of my knees, and I try twisting my body, but it doesn’t work. Maybe I am upside down…but that concept doesn’t apply anymore. I am whichever way, down or up. All at once, I contract my body into a fetal position, slam my eyes shut and breathe heavily, my heart pounding in the back of my ears. My sickness subsides, and I start to cry again. After some time, a rage sinks in and I tear my vocal cords screaming and howling. I would pass out if I didn’t hyperventilate first with infinite insecurity. Endorphins bubble out of my brain. I black out; my body goes limp.

               Drifting in and out of consciousness, I realize my oxygen is running low, having only approached the work outside the ship with enough in my tank for a few hours.

               My body begins to take in the air with long hard breaths, my fears subsiding for the moment. As I stare out into the darkness, small shapes of dimly lit suns and galaxies glow softly as if a painting in the distance. I begin to cough, causing flares of pain in my torn throat tissue. Blood spat out into the inside of my helmet, causing my view to be through a red Rorschach image, complete with mental interpretation. Blood slowly drips down, leaving opaque streaks of red, drying there, permanently hazing my only view.

               I can feel blood drying on my neck and lips, itching me, and the inside of my helmet is beginning to smell of old copper and sweat, my tears mixing with the blood, invigorating my sense of being alive. This was not what I wanted. I know the eventuality…but wish for my mind to stop analyzing. I told myself to just stop…I wouldn’t listen, and darkness takes me over.

               Some time has passed; everything is calmer now, my oxygen is running out. Drifting in and out of consciousness, my body feels limp and drained.

               I open my eyes for the last few seconds and stare into the distance, the painting in the background is beautiful. So beautiful, it is only fate to be enjoyed for the last few seconds of my life. Dying alone, to the only sound, my faint shallow breathing; the blackness swallows me, and everything is gone.

title: [SF][HR] Float

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about Allen William Brier's fellow technicians?

answer: No answer

answer: The story does not mention any fellow technicians.

answer: The story seems to suggest that Allen William Brier is the only technician to survive the ordeal. At the time the story happens, Allen William Brier was an 1st class mechanic.

answer: No answer

answer: The story does not mention anything about Allen William Brier's fellow technicians.

answer: No answer

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about the cold?

answer: The narrator's helmet gets drenched in his own tears and blood. Since he doesn't have anything to hang on to and the space feels so dark and oily, he has a hard time getting some light to see. He feels cold and thirsty as well as lonely.

text: The highlighted text is irrelevant.

refinement: Space feels so dark and oily. He feels cold and thirsty as well as lonely.

text: The story never mentioned anything about being thirsty.

refinement: Space feels so dark and oily. He feels cold and lonely.

answer: The narrator sees fuzzy red dots through his torn throat tissue, which is what is left of this burning body. The oxygen is running out in his tank, hastening his death. He feels cold and thirsty as well as afraid.

text: The highlighted text is irrelevant to the question.

refinement: He feels cold and thirsty as well as afraid.

text: Brier being thirsty was not mentioned in the story.

text: Add more details about the cold.

refinement: Brier is outside his ship and floating inside a wormhole in space, so everything is freezing cold. The cold even invades his nightmares when he is attacked by the wet, black substance he coughed up. He wakes up disoriented. The darkness surrounding Brier is murky, cold, and oily.

answer: The narrator is floating in space and feels cold. He is also afraid of the dark.

text: There is no mention of Brier being afraid of the dark. This should be removed.

refinement: The narrator is floating in space and feels cold.

answer: The narrator foresees his death with thoughts of the cold. He wishes for his mind to stop analyzing the inevitable. His calm comes from the lack of warmth and cold. He passes out. He fears the cold in his own skin.

text: The response is incorrect and needs a new answer.

refinement: Brier is floating inside a wormhole in space, so everything is freezing cold. In his sleep, he is attacked by the cold, wet, black substance he coughed up in his dream. He wakes up disoriented. The darkness surrounding Brier is murky, cold, and oily.

answer: No answer

text: There should be an answer because references to cold are available.

refinement: Brier is outside his ship and floating inside a wormhole in space, so everything is freezing cold. The cold even invades his nightmares when he is attacked by the wet, black substance he coughed up. He wakes up disoriented. The darkness surrounding Brier is murky, cold, and oily.

answer: The narrator feels cold when his oxygen runs out.

text: The response is incorrect. The narrator doesn't feel cold when his oxygen runs out.

text: Explain why he feels cold.

refinement: The narrator feels cold because he is floating in outer space. He dreams about a cold, black substance. When he wakes up, he is disoriented by the cold, murky, and oily darkness.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about darkness?

answer: No answer

text: There should be a response because the topic of darkness was discussed in the story.

refinement: Brier was working outside the ship when it exploded, sending him into space where he now aimlessly floats. He is swallowed up by murky, cold, and oily darkness. Brier can see small shapes of dimly lit suns and galaxies as he stares out into the darkness. Brier is running out of oxygen and darkness takes over as he lapses into unconsciousness.

answer: Darkness is the last thing the narrator sees before he dies.

answer: It's a combination of breath, sweat, coughing, and blood that washes over the narrator. Darkness sweeps over and swallows the narrator, taking his body and mind into the blackness.

answer: Darkness is huge and engulfs everything. The narrator feels his body going limp and weak, his vision blurry and dark. The last few seconds of his life were also in darkness. Darkness also swallows up all.

text: "Darkness also swallows up all." - redundant.

refinement: Darkness is huge and engulfs everything. The narrator feels his body going limp and weak, his vision blurry and dark. The last few seconds of his life were also in darkness.

answer: Darkness is a metaphor for the narrator's confusing and dense thoughts as his oxygen runs out.

text: Darkness is not a metaphor. The narrator really experienced darkness engulfing him because his oxygen was running out and he was dying.

refinement: Darkness engulfs the narrator as his oxygen runs out.

answer: No answer

answer: Darkness is huge and engulfs everything. The narrator feels his body going limp, his vision blurry and dark. The last few seconds of his life were also in darkness. Darkness also swallows up all.

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question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about legs?

answer: No answer

text: There should be a response because "Legs" was mentioned several times in the course of the story.

refinement: Brier's ship exploded while he was outside and now he's floating in space. He doesn't want his limbs dangling out in space, so he tries to bring his legs up to his chest in a fetal position. However, his suit is too bulky and slippery so he bends his knees and sits cross-legged. However, he falls asleep and his legs uncross. He wakes up feeling sick and his legs kick out and hyperextend.

answer: The narrator feels like he doesn't deserve to be called a survivor because he died afterward.

text: The response doesn't make sense. It never went down like that and the story has enough content for a correct response.

text: Add the correct response.

refinement: Brier's ship exploded while he was outside and now he's floating in space. He doesn't want his limbs dangling out in space, so he tries to bring his legs up to his chest in a fetal position. However, his suit is too bulky and slippery so he bends his knees and sits cross-legged. However, he falls asleep and his legs uncross. He dreams of coughing a black, mucus-like substance that spreads and touches his leg. He wakes up feeling sick and his legs kick out and hyperextend.

answer: The narrator tries to bring his legs up to his chest, but the suit is too bulky. He then tries to cross his legs, but the suit doesn't allow him to. He later tries to kick his legs, but it doesn't work. The narrator is trying to hold on to his legs to feel close to himself.

answer: Allen William Brier is a survivor in the aftermath of a starship going into a wormhole, a hole in space connecting two distant points in the universe. He’s wearing a suit made of a plastic-like material to protect him from radiation at high altitudes,  and the suit has high ankles to allow him to walk in space. His legs don’t have to be flexible for walking as he stays in one position on a metal or metal-like surface.

text: The response doesn't answer the question and should be revised to reflect the topic.

refinement: Brier's ship exploded while he was outside and now he's floating in space. He doesn't want his limbs dangling out in space, so he tries to bring his legs up to his chest in a fetal position. However, his suit is too bulky and slippery so he bends his knees and sits cross-legged. However, he falls asleep and his legs uncross. He dreams of coughing a black, mucus-like substance that spreads and touches his leg. He wakes up feeling sick and his legs kick out and hyperextend.

answer: Allen William Brier is a survivor in the aftermath of a starship going into a wormhole, a hole in space connecting two distant points in the universe. He’s wearing a suit made of a plastic-like material to protect him from radiation at high altitudes, and the suit has high ankles to allow him to walk in space. His legs don’t have to be flexible for walking as he stays in one position on a metal or metal-like surface.

answer: The narrator is scared of floating away and tries to pull his legs close to his chest. He curls into a fetal position and kicks out his legs, but they don't work. He tries to twist his body, but it doesn't work. He kicks out his legs again, and they are burning. He kicks them out again, and they are still burning.

text: "He kicks them out again, and they are still burning." - redundant.

refinement: The narrator is scared of floating away and tries to pull his legs close to his chest. He curls into a fetal position and kicks out his legs, but they don't work. He tries to twist his body, but it doesn't work. He kicks out his legs again, and they are burning.

answer: The narrator tries to bring his legs up to his chest, but the suit is too bulky. He then tries to cross his legs, but the suit doesn't allow him to. He later tries to kick his legs, but it doesn't work.

answer:
The narrator is Allen William Brier, a 1st Class Mechanical Technician of the Belle Celeste. He was doing repairs when the ship was attacked by a wormhole. He feels he doesn't deserve to be called a survivor because he died afterward.

The narrator doesn't like the word "walking".


text:
I had an incredible dream last night.

I was blissful, confident and felt as if I was on top of the world. I had an absolutely stunningly beautiful girlfriend who was always by my side. She had quite thick gentle lips, perfect for kissing. Captivating wide eyes, unfortunately I don't remember the colour they were, but they reminded me of the moon. Long enchanting hair which fell down to the top half of her back. A delicate and subtle strand of hair which covered a portion of her left eye. This girl in my dream, she was everything I desired in a partner. The true definition of beauty and elegance.

As much as I try to remember, I can't recall the first part of the dream. I remember everything from the middle to the end. I remember driving in a car with this girl, my dream partner beside me. We were on our way to meet her parents. Although it was a dream, I could feel the nerves and anxiety that comes when meeting your girlfriends parents for the first time. That's something which has always been a great fear of mine and my dream reflected that.

This dream girl, the girl that I've desired and wished would come into my life was finally with me. Regardless of it being a dream, it felt so real. I could feel her comfort, her warmth and gentle touch. Each embrace with her I could feel throughout my body. Tingling sensations within my fingertips every time my hands touched her skin. How could this be a dream? How can something which embraces all of my senses not be the truth?

All of a sudden we had arrived at her parents house. Although it wasn't a house in the dream, it looked like a huge stadium where all of her relatives and family were gathered. All for one purpose to meet me, the person who had made her daughter fall head over hills in love. We both sat down on a tiny couch in the center of what felt like a stadium, surrounded by piercing eyes and judgmental looks. She grasped my hand and looked into my eyes. The nerves, the anxiety and hesitation instantly disintegrated. One gaze from this girls eyes made me feel invincible. I could only describe it as love, actual meaningful, and rarity that is true love. The kind of love which we question as to whether it exists, endlessly we search for it and deep down we feel as though we will never find it.

Her father walked over to us. He sat directly in front of me, starring endlessly into my eyes. Questioning me, ensuring that I loved his daughter. I remember her warm gentle hand gradually running up and down my back, each of her fingernails gently scratching and soothing me, comforting me.  I could feel the words coming out of my mouth, smoothly and without hesitation. The father smiled and backed away. Instantly I knew that he saw our love was real. All of a sudden the stadium like house roared with applause and cheers. Out of nowhere music started playing. I looked at the girl of my dreams beside me. I slowly stood up, reached out my hand and she took it. I pulled her close and we began to dance.

My dancing was horrific just like in real life. I was uncoordinated but each step was corrected by my dream girl. We both had beaming smiles on our faces, we were spinning around the dance floor embraced in each other's arms. She was wearing a backless dress. My left hand was gently running up and down her back, her skin radiating with warmth. We both looked into each other's eyes, slowly my eyes moved down towards her lips, becoming fixated on them. I leaned in for the kiss and she followed. Our lips collided, gently brushing against one another. I can't even begin to describe the overwhelming sensations that this kiss gave me. It felt as if my entire body was weightless, as if we were in the middle of space alone and without gravity.

We both opened our eyes and ever so slowly pulled away from each other, the dream then ended. I awoke to find myself back in reality. Stricken again with social anxiety, depression and desperate to find the girl of my dreams.

title: [RO][FN] Dream Girl - True Story (Short)

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the climactic event of the story.

answer: The protagonist has an incredible dream about a girl with whom he falls deeply in love. In the climax of the dream, they share a romantic kiss which sends them to float in space, surrounded by love.

text: The kiss didn't actually send them to space. The protagonist just feels weightless as if he's in space from the kiss.

refinement: The protagonist has an incredible dream about a girl with whom he falls deeply in love. In the climax of the dream, they share a romantic kiss which makes the protagonist feel as if they're floating in space.

answer: The ending of the dream is the climax of the story.

text: This is too vague. Specify that the climax takes place during the end of the dream when the narrator and girl finally kiss.

refinement: The climax takes place at the end of the dream, where the narrator and girl finally kiss. The narrator feels overwhelmed with sensations and like he is floating in space.

answer: The male protagonist dreams that the dream girl loves him and performs the most awkward dance ever with her. However, after being questioned by her parents, he realizes that the relationship between them is not all that it seems to be in his mind. Perfectly polite but formal.

text: This is not the climax of the story.

text: Blank response

refinement: The climax takes place at the end of the dream, where the narrator and girl finally kiss. The narrator feels overwhelmed with sensations and like he is floating in space.

answer: The main character and the girl of his dreams are on their way to her parents. He will meet them for the first time, their aim is to prove they are in love. This happens in a dream and the main character handles himself very well. He is accepted by her family and they enjoy a dance together, culminating in a kiss that makes the main character feel weightless and overwhelmed.

text: This is not a part of the climax and should be omitted.

refinement: In the dream, the main character is accepted by his girlfriend's family and they enjoy a dance together, culminating in a kiss that makes the main character feel weightless and overwhelmed.

answer: The climax of the story is the moment the dreamer meets the beautiful girl in his dream at her parents' house. While they are dancing, they lock eyes and then kiss passionately. The dream ends with the dreamer waking up feeling lonely in reality.

text: This is not the climax. The rest of the answer describes the climax.

refinement: The climax of the story is the moment the dreamer meets when the dreamer and his girlfriend are dancing, they lock eyes and then kiss passionately. The dream ends with the dreamer waking up feeling lonely in reality.

text: IT's omitted that the kiss makes the dreamer feel weightless and overcome with sensation.

refinement: The climax of the story is the moment the dreamer meets when the dreamer and his girlfriend are dancing, they lock eyes and then kiss passionately. The kiss makes the dreamer feel weightless and overcome with sensation. The dream ends with the dreamer waking up feeling lonely in reality.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

Summarize the primary source of tension in the story.

answer: The primary source of tension in the story is interdiction. Regardless of whether this dream happened, the narrator has a lot internal conflict over whether or not the dream is real and how that dream girl interferes with his current reality. This story is a metaphor for how the narrator thinks about life, his relationships, and people in general.

text: This isn't the correct source of tension, additionally the answer is too assumptive.

text: Empty response

refinement: The primary source of tension is the narrator's desire to find his dream girl and his battle with his social anxiety. He has nerves throughout the story, which are only alleviated when he feels accepted by his dream girl in his dream. Once he wakes up, those sources of tension still remain.

answer: The dream girl's father demands a response from the would-be suitor at the end of the story in scene.

text: This answer is inaccurate. This does not happen.

text: Empty response

refinement: The primary source of tension is the narrator's desire to find his dream girl and his battle with his social anxiety. He has nerves throughout the story, which are only alleviated when he feels accepted by his dream girl in his dream. Once he wakes up, those sources of tension still remain.

answer: The primary tension in the story is the protagonist's longing to meet and find a meaningful love relationship with a beautiful girl. Despite having an incredible dream in which the girl of his dreams embodied those qualities, the protagonist is now back in reality where he struggles with anxiety, depression, and a fear of not finding her.

text: It's omitted that the desire to find the relationship is paired with the author's anxiety as the main source of tension

refinement: The primary tension in the story is the protagonist's longing to meet and find a meaningful love relationship with a beautiful girl and his battle with his own anxiety. Despite having an incredible dream in which the girl of his dreams embodied those qualities, the protagonist is now back in reality where he struggles with anxiety, depression, and a fear of not finding her.

answer: The primary tension in the story is between the protagonist and social anxiety. He dreams of meeting an absolutely stunningly beautiful girlfriend, but is afraid that such a person does not exist and he may never be comfortable enough to meet her parents. On their first attempt, the protagonist feels enormous pressure to impress and finds himself uncoordinated and nervous. Despite these worries, the dream girl proves her love and the experience leaves him with overwhelming sensations. Upon awakening from the dream, the protagonist is left striving and longing to meet the dream girl that brought him such happiness.

text: It's omitted that when the protagonist woke up, he was socially anxious again.

refinement: The primary tension in the story is between the protagonist and social anxiety. He dreams of meeting an absolutely stunningly beautiful girlfriend, but is afraid that such a person does not exist and he may never be comfortable enough to meet her parents. On their first attempt, the protagonist feels enormous pressure to impress and finds himself uncoordinated and nervous. Despite these worries, the dream girl proves her love and the experience leaves him with overwhelming sensations. Upon awakening from the dream, the protagonist is socially anxious again and left striving and longing to meet the dream girl that brought him such happiness.

text: It's omitted that the other source of tension is the protagonist's longing for his dream girl.

refinement: The primary tension in the story is between the protagonist and his desire to find his dream girl paired with his social anxiety. He dreams of meeting an absolutely stunningly beautiful girlfriend, but is afraid that such a person does not exist and he may never be comfortable enough to meet her parents. On their first attempt, the protagonist feels enormous pressure to impress and finds himself uncoordinated and nervous. Despite these worries, the dream girl proves her love and the experience leaves him with overwhelming sensations. Upon awakening from the dream, the protagonist is socially anxious again and left striving and longing to meet the dream girl that brought him such happiness.

text: This isn't really what the protagonist fears. He's just nervous to meet the parents initially. This should be omitted.

refinement: The primary tension in the story is between the protagonist and his desire to find his dream girl paired with his social anxiety. He dreams of meeting an absolutely stunningly beautiful girlfriend. On their first attempt, the protagonist feels enormous pressure to impress and finds himself uncoordinated and nervous. Despite these worries, the dream girl proves her love and the experience leaves him with overwhelming sensations. Upon awakening from the dream, the protagonist is socially anxious again and left striving and longing to meet the dream girl that brought him such happiness.

answer: The main character has a dream where he meets the parents of his dream girl and all goes smoothly despite his nerves. He speaks eloquently and convinces the girl's father that he truly loves his daughter. He is accepted to the family. When he wakes up, he is stricken with his usual social anxiety, depression and desperation. He escaped it for a few moments in his sleep.

text: This isn't necessarily the source of tension and should be omitted.

refinement: When he wakes up, he is stricken with his usual social anxiety, depression and desperation. He escaped it for a few moments in his sleep.

text: The protagonist's main source of tension is omitted.

refinement: The primary source of tension is the narrator's desire to find his dream girl and his battle with his social anxiety. He has nerves throughout the story, which are only alleviated when he feels accepted by his dream girl in his dream. When he wakes up, he is stricken with his usual social anxiety, depression and desperation. He escaped it for a few moments in his sleep.

question:
Answer the following question based on the above passage:

What does the story say about social anxiety?

answer: The story describes social anxiety as a fear, mainly one of meeting someone's parents for the first time. While the dream was just a dream, and the protagonist experienced intense feelings while meeting the girl of his dreams in that setting, the anxiety he feels in the real world is real and valid. The story makes clear that meeting the girl of his dreams was intimidating, and while he was able to overcome the anxiety while dreaming, it persists in real life.

text: This sentence is worded strangely. It would be better to say that not only did the protagonist experience this anxiety in the dream, but he wakes up with it in real life.

refinement: The story describes social anxiety as a fear, mainly one of meeting someone's parents for the first time. Not only did the protagonist experience this anxiety in the dream, but he wakes up with it in real life. The story makes clear that meeting the girl of his dreams was intimidating, and while he was able to overcome the anxiety while dreaming, it persists in real life.

text: It's omitted that the girl of his dreams and her acceptance is what helps rid the protagonist of anxiety.

refinement: The story describes social anxiety as a fear, mainly one of meeting someone's parents for the first time. The girl of his dreams and her acceptance is what helps rid the protagonist of anxiety. Not only did the protagonist experience this anxiety in the dream, but he wakes up with it in real life. The story makes clear that meeting the girl of his dreams was intimidating, and while he was able to overcome the anxiety while dreaming, it persists in real life.

answer: The dream portrays social anxiety as being detrimental to finding true love. However, when the dreamer meets the girl of his dreams, he feels a sense of love, calm, and confidence when with her which instantly eliminates his inhibitions and social anxiety. This indicates that social anxiety can be overcome through finding love.

text: The dream does not portray social anxiety as being detrimental to finding true love. This should be omitted.

refinement: When the dreamer meets the girl of his dreams, he feels a sense of love, calm, and confidence when with her which instantly eliminates his inhibitions and social anxiety. This indicates that social anxiety can be overcome through finding love.

text: It's omitted that the idea of the dreamer meeting his girlfriend's parents gave him anxiety.

refinement: When the dreamer meets the girl of his dreams, he feels a sense of love, calm, and confidence when with her which instantly eliminates his inhibitions and social anxiety. This even solves the anxiety he had felt when he met her parents. This indicates that social anxiety can be overcome through finding love.

text: It's omitted that despite the anxiety being cured in the dream, the narrator feels all of his social anxiety again when he wakes up.

refinement: When the dreamer meets the girl of his dreams, he feels a sense of love, calm, and confidence when with her which instantly eliminates his inhibitions and social anxiety. This even solves the anxiety he had felt when he met her parents. This indicates that social anxiety can be overcome through finding love. However, despite the anxiety being cured in the dream, the narrator feels all of his social anxiety again when he wakes up.

answer: The narrator wakes up with social anxiety, depression, and wanting to find the dream girl like they never have before.

text: This doesn't really answer the question and should be rewritten.

text: Blank response

refinement: When the dreamer meets the girl of his dreams, he feels a sense of love, calm, and confidence when with her which instantly eliminates his inhibitions and social anxiety. This even solves the anxiety he had felt when he met her parents. This indicates that social anxiety can be overcome through finding love. However, despite the anxiety being cured in the dream, the narrator feels all of his social anxiety again when he wakes up.

answer: The main character has severe social anxiety coupled with depression and desperation to find the girl of his dreams. He is freed from these burdens in his dreams. He could face his great fear of meeting his dream girl's parents and surviving to tell the tale. He was buoyed by the vicinity of, and eye contact with his dream girl, and he spoke smoothly and without hesitation. When he wakes up he realizes that this will never happen in reality because he is being held back from meeting this dream girl by his social anxiety.

text: This is a bit off. The story doesn't necessarily describe the social anxiety and inability to find a girlfriend as connnected. It would be better to say that when he wakes up he realizes he still has social anxiety and wants to find his dream girl.

refinement: The main character has severe social anxiety coupled with depression and desperation to find the girl of his dreams. He is freed from these burdens in his dreams. He could face his great fear of meeting his dream girl's parents and surviving to tell the tale. He was buoyed by the vicinity of, and eye contact with his dream girl, and he spoke smoothly and without hesitation. When he wakes up he realizes he still has social anxiety and wants to find his dream girl.

answer: The narrator felt social anxiety about meeting the girl's parents for the first time. The girl's father tried to see if he liked him enough to make them kiss. The narrator talks about how the father approved of the relationship, but the narrator was still afraid to kiss her because he felt that his dancing skills were not good enough. He tries to kiss her when they were both dancing. He did not perform well, and the girl corrected him. Then they did kiss, and the narrator found himself floating in space with his whole body weightless and in outer space. After that, they opened their eyes, and woke back to reality. In a real world, the narrator would experience social anxiety in everyday situations.

text: This is all inaccurate and does not relate to the question.

refinement: The narrator felt social anxiety about meeting the girl's parents for the first time. Then they did kiss, and the narrator found himself floating in space with his whole body weightless and in outer space. After that, they opened their eyes, and woke back to reality. In a real world, the narrator would experience social anxiety in everyday situations.

text: This doesn't really add anything about social anxiety. It would be better to say that the girl of his dreams and her acceptance of him helped ease his anxiety and give him confidence.

refinement: The narrator felt social anxiety about meeting the girl's parents for the first time. The girl of their dreams and their acceptance of him helped ease his anxiety and give him confidence.  After that, they opened their eyes, and woke back to reality. In a real world, the narrator would experience social anxiety in everyday situations.