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“I don’t play with female gamers,” says Tyler “Ninja” Blevins, Twitch’s biggest streamer and one of the faces of the _Fortnite_ fandom. This edict may be surprising to hear, especially as emphatically as Blevins said it when we spoke at a recent Samsung event.

Though Blevins isn’t shy about being married, and his more than 10 million subscribers include people of every gender identity, the internet’s love of gossip has convinced the Twitch star not to invite women to participate in his __ _Fortnite Battle Royale_ livestreams. With fame comes scrutiny of every thing you say or do, he suggested, and that can sometimes lead to questions about who you’re sleeping or flirting with on the sly.

“If I have one conversation with one female streamer where we’re playing with one another, and even if there’s a hint of flirting, that is going to be taken and going to be put on every single video and be clickbait forever,” Blevins told Polygon.

There’s some truth to the idea that flirting can lead to YouTube clickbait and invasive questions — Blevins has asked some himself when playing with other well-known (male) streamers. Take the clip below, from a Twitch stream with _Fortnite_ star Ali “Myth” Kabbani.

Imane “Pokimane” Anys is another big name on Twitch whose popularity grew rapidly over the last year, and when she started playing _Fortnite_ on streams with Kabbani, viewers began to ask: Are they dating? Fans assume Twitch streamers are in a relationship just as often as they speculate on their marital status. And that apparently includes Blevins, who used his mega-platform to further perpetuate that rumor.

Whether or not it’s true that Anys and Kabbani are together is, obviously, their business. But when it comes to his relationship with streamer Jessica “Jghosty” Blevins, who often appears on her husband’s channel, Blevins is happy to open up about his devotion.

“[Not being connected to other women online,] that was something I made 100-percent sure,” he said. It was his decision alone to keep his streaming partners men-only. “That was not even her. She had nothing to do with it. That was me being, ‘I love our relationship,’ and, ‘No — I’m not even gonna put you through that.’”

A growing Twitch means a diminishing sense of privacy, especially for women on the platform. Female streamers have opened up before about the difficulty in maintaining a separation between their Twitch personas and who they are offline — often at the behest of viewers who demand answers, lest they assume what’s going on for themselves.

Respect is a major part of playing _Fortnite_ and other games. Yet women often are the receiving end of anything but: “Twitch thots,” harassment, warding off obsessive or judgmental viewers are all serious concerns for well-known female streamers. In contrast to the reality of being a woman on Twitch, Blevins’ choice to draw a line feels like a conservative gesture — even a familiar, divisive one.

“There hasn’t been a single female gamer or streamer on Twitch or anything like that who’s been upset about that,” he said of possible pushback. “I honestly think that [...] it’s just kinda like a respect thing.”

Ninja may not hear criticism of his decision, but similar gender-based views have received pushback in the political sphere — think of the outcry surrounding Vice President Mike Pence’s supposed marital boundaries. Still, the Twitch streamer is sticking to his absolute, which he believes is the only choice.

“The only way to avoid that [gossip] is to not play with them at all.”

UPDATE: Ninja has since responded to — and stood by — his comments to us on Twitter. Read more in our follow-up story.

question: Summarize the mentality of livestream viewers that Blevins is trying to deal with.

answer: According to Blevins and other influencers, female streamers have received a lot of questions and rumors about dating their partners. These questions and rumors are not something these streamers seem happy about. Blevins, for example, feels that the gossip that circulates about this is damaging to relationships.

critique: The article doesn't say the gossip is damaging to any relationships. It also doesn't say that Blevins says this.

critique: The answer should mention that the gossip is damaging to the streamers' privacy.

critique: The response is completely wrong. The streamers don't mind the questions and rumors. Blevins thinks that it is damaging to his relationship and decides to not play with female streamers.

critique: "According to Blevins and other influencers, female streamers have received a lot of questions and rumors about dating their partners." - this is incorrect. It was never mentioned if the influencers are happy or not with the rumors.


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NEIL MALHOTRA is an American political economist. He is the Edith M. Cornell Professor of Political Economy in the Graduate School of Business at Stanford University, where he is also the Louise and Claude N. Rosenbrg, Jr. Director of the Center for Social Innovation. He studies the politics of the United States, survey methodology, and voter behavior in elections, including work on retrospective voting and on the politics of disaster preparedness and relief.

Education and early work

Malhotra attended Yale University, where he earned his BA in economics in 2002.[1] At Yale he was mentored by Donald Green, whom he has credited with inspiring him to become a political scientist.[2] He then attended Stanford University, earning an MA in 2005 and a PhD in 2008.[3]

After obtaining his PhD, Malhotra joined the faculty at the Stanford University Graduate School of Business.[4] He remained there until 2010, when he moved to the political science department at the University of Pennsylvania.[5] In 2011, he returned to the Graduate School of Business at Stanford University, where he is also affiliated with the political science department.[6]

Career

Academic positions

Since 2015, Malhotra has been the Louise and Claude N. Rosenberg Jr. Director of the Center for Social Innovation. In 2017 he was named the Edith M. Cornell Professor of Political Economy,[7] and in 2019 he was named The Susan Ford Dorsey Faculty Fellow at the Stanford University Graduate School of Business.[8]

Research

Malhotra has published work on American politics, voting behavior in elections and other forms of political behavior, and the methodology of survey research.[9] His work on voter behavior includes research on the problem of retrospective voting, and how strongly voters consider past events when arriving at a vote choice.[10] Malhotra has also published work on disaster response by governments, and how that response is rewarded or punished by voters. In 2009 he published the study “Myopic voters and natural disaster policy” in the _American Political Science Review_,[11] which led to consultations with the Federal Emergency Management Agency about optimal disaster preparedness.[12] The study showed evidence that voters reward incumbents for disaster relief spending, but not for disaster preparedness spending.[13][14][15]

Since 2018, Malhotra has been a frequent contributor to _Forbes_.[16] He has been quoted or cited in _The Washington Post_ regarding topics such as government crisis response strategies,[17] the effects of major external events on elections,[18] and corporate responsibility,[19] and on similar topics in venues like _The Atlantic_,[20] _The New York Times_,[21][22] and _Fortune_.[23]

Awards

During 2012–2013, Malhotra was the recipient of a grant from the Russell Sage Foundation to study how voters weight recent events compared to events in the distant past, which is related to the question of retrospective voting in American politics.[24]

In 2015, _Poets & Quants_ listed Malhotra as one of the top 40 professors under 40 years old.[25] In 2016, Malhotra won the Emerging Scholar Award from the Elections, Public Opinion, and Voting Behavior Section of the American Political Science Association, which “is awarded to the top scholar in the field who is within 10 years of her or his PhD”.[26]

Selected works

-   “Completion Time and Response Order Effects in Web Surveys”, _Public Opinion Quarterly_ 72(5):914–934 (2008)
-   “Myopic Voters and Natural Disaster Policy”, with Andrew Healy, _American Political Science Review_ 103(3):387–406 (2009)
-   “Irrelevant events affect voters' evaluations of government performance”, with Andrew J. Healy and Cecilia Hyunjung Mo, _PNAS_ 107(29):12804–12809 (2010)
-   “Retrospective Voting Reconsidered”, with Andrew Healy, _Annual Review of Political Science_ 16:285–306 (2013)
-   “Publication bias in the social sciences: Unlocking the file drawer”, with Annie Franco and Gabor Simonovits, _Science_ 345(6203):1502–1505 (2014)

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title: Neil Malhotra

question: What does the text say about Malhorta's personal life?

answer: No answer

question: What does the text say about Neil Malhorta's career?

answer: Neil Malhorta is an American political economist. He is the Edith M. Cornell Professor of Political Economy in the Graduate School of Business at Stanford University, where he is also the Louise and Claude N. Rosenberg, Jr. Director of the Center for Social Innovation. He studies the politics of the United States, survey methodology, and voter behavior in elections, including work on retrospective voting and on the politics of disaster preparedness and relief.

critique: The answer should mention his work at the University of Pennsylvania.

critique: The answer should mention his work as a political scientist.

critique: The answer should mention his career before 2015.

critique: The answer is not related to Malhotra's career.

question: What does the text say about Malhorta's research?

answer: He has published work on American politics, voter behavior in elections, and methodology of survey research. Malhotra has researched the problem of retrospective voting, how voters weight recent events in comparison to remote past events. He has also studied the government's response to natural disasters and how that response is rewarded or punished by voters. He published the study "Myopic voters and natural disaster policy" in 2009, which led to consultations with the Federal Emergency Management Agency about optimal disaster preparedness. The study showed that voters reward incumbents for disaster relief spending, but not for disaster preparedness spending.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

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question: What does the text say about Malhorta's education?

answer: Malhotra attended Yale University, where he earned his BA in 2002. He then went on to Stanford University, earning an MA in 2005 and a PhD in 2008.

critique: The answer should mention that Malhotra earned his PhD in economics.

critique: The answer should mention that he earned his BA in economics.


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[U.S. President Donald Trump shortly after delivering his first State of the Union address Tuesday night. Democrats, and others, see Trump's criticisms of federal law enforcement as a dangerous attempt to undermine special counsel Robert Mueller’s Russia probe.]

[Daniel Dale]

Daniel DaleWashington Bureau Chief

__Wed., Jan. 31, 20185 min. read

Article was updated Feb. 01, 2018

WASHINGTON — U.S. President Donald Trump is at war with his own law enforcement officials. More than ever before, he has backup from his party.

And law enforcement has started pushing back.

The day after Trump’s State of the Union address was dominated by an extraordinary series of developments in which the Federal Bureau of Investigation and Department of Justice challenged Trump both on the record and through what appeared to be anonymous leaks to CNN.

The until-recently-unusual spectre of the “law-and-order” party attempting to undermine law enforcement agencies comes during the ongoing special counsel investigation of the Trump campaign’s links to the Russian government. Democrats, and others, see Republicans’ criticism as an attempt to protect the president by diminishing public faith in Robert Mueller’s probe.

“We’re no longer dealing in the realm of facts and reason when it comes to grave matters of security and justice,” Amanda Carpenter, a Republican former communications director for Sen. Ted Cruz, wrote in Politico. “We are, at Donald Trump’s behest, fully engulfed in a narrative explicitly designed to impugn and destroy the credibility of the law enforcement agency tasked with investigating the Trump campaign’s relationship with Russia during the 2016 election.”

In seeking short-term political gain, Trump and his allies will do long-term damage to federal law enforcement, said Matthew Miller, Justice spokesperson during the Obama administration. He pointed to the effects of conservatives’ attacks on other pillars of U.S. society.

“The first one they went after, starting decades ago, was the media. Now Republicans don’t believe what they hear on any channel other than Fox News. Then they moved to scientists … and now you see in polls Republicans who just don’t believe in scientists. They’ve turned on universities, and you see this rising discontent among conservatives about university. They are now turning on federal law enforcement,” Miller said in an interview.

“And if a significant percentage of the population — 35, 40 per cent — believes that federal law enforcement is biased, you’ll see those people less likely to co-operate with investigations, less likely to blow the whistle, and less likely to believe DOJ prosecutors when they sit on juries. It is extremely damaging to the long-term ability of those institutions to do their jobs.”

Others said Trump’s actions were risking deep damage to his own government.

“The growing and dizzying array of threats by Trump, and threats by officials to resign in response to Trump’s threats, suggest that this is not a stable situation (how could it be?),” Jack Goldsmith, an assistant attorney general in George W. Bush’s Republican administration, said on Twitter on Saturday.

“When Trump finally gets tired of being ignored and follows through on something stupid, the executive branch meltdown will be severe, to his enormous detriment (and hopefully not the country’s).”

[Republican Rep. Devin Nunes, after a Tuesday meeting with House GOP members on Capitol Hill. Nunes is at the centre of a controversy over the potential release of a secret memo purported to show improper use of surveillance by the FBI and Justice Department.]

The Republican attacks have been encouraged by increasingly conspiratorial Fox coverage centred on what hosts have called a “Deep State” attempting to topple Trump. Senior Republican politicians who once kept their distance from such arguments have begun to echo their language.

“Cleanse the organization,” House Speaker Paul Ryan said of the FBI on Tuesday.

The most dramatic developments on Wednesday centred on a secret four-page memorandum, authored by aides to pro-Trump chairman of the House Intelligence Committee, Republican Rep. Devin Nunes, that Nunes claims will reveal “abuses” by the FBI in investigating Trump’s campaign.

Republican politicians have made a rallying cry of the phrase “release the memo.” (Ryan made his “cleanse” remark while speaking about the memo.) And they voted last week to do so despite the formal objections of a top Justice Department official who said a release “would be extraordinarily reckless” if Justice was not given a chance to review the memo and advise of possible harm.

Donald Trump was overheard Tuesday telling a GOP lawmaker he is "100 percent" in favor of releasing a classified memo on the Russia investigation that has sparked a political fight pitting Republicans against the FBI and the Justice Department. (The Associated Press)

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Trump has not made a final decision. But when a Republican congressman urged him after his Tuesday speech to release the memo, he breezily said, “Don’t worry, 100 per cent.”

Trump’s hand-picked FBI director, Christopher Wray, and hand-picked Deputy Attorney General, Rod Rosenstein, pleaded with Trump’s chief of staff on Monday not to release the memo, the Washington Post has reported. And then they went further.

In a move that has no obvious recent precedent, the FBI made its objections public on Wednesday — and effectively endorsed the view of Democrats who have called the memo highly misleading.

“As expressed during our initial review, we have grave concerns about material omissions of fact that fundamentally impact the memo’s accuracy,” the FBI said.

Later in the afternoon, CNN broke two stories that further called into question Trump’s interactions with and statements about law enforcement.

The first reported that Trump had asked Rosenstein if Rosenstein was “on my team” — a request that echoes his widely criticized alleged request for “loyalty” from then-FBI director James Comey — and suggested to lawmakers questions they could ask Rosenstein to try to discredit the Mueller probe.

The second reported that Peter Strzok, the FBI agent removed from the Mueller probe over text messages in which he criticized Trump, had supported the FBI’s late-campaign decision to reopen the investigation into Hillary Clinton’s emails. Republicans, including Trump, had previously seized on Strzok’s texts as evidence of FBI bias against him.

All of this comes just two days after the FBI’s deputy director, Andrew McCabe, stepped down under fierce pressure from Trump, who had accused him of bias because his wife’s Democratic campaign for a seat in Virginia’s state senate received political donations from allies of Virginia Gov. Terry McAuliffe, an ally of Clinton.

That, in turn, came four days after the New York Times reported Trump had ordered Mueller’s firing but backed off when White House counsel Donald McGahn threatened to quit.

All of the turmoil raised bipartisan fears that Trump would attempt another round of firings — of Rosenstein, with whom he is now engaged in a multi-front battle, or perhaps of Mueller once more. Democrats have warned that terminating Mueller would create the biggest crisis of Trump’s presidency.

If Trump refrains or is restrained from self-harm, however, his Fox-aided campaign to persuade Americans not to trust law enforcement may create an outcome that works for him personally even as it hurts the country more broadly.

If Republican voters have scant faith in Mueller and the Justice Department, their representatives are especially unlikely to pursue justice in the form of impeachment or resignation pressure, no matter what the facts say.

Said Miller: “When Bob Mueller finishes his work, he may have damning evidence against the president — and there will be a certain percentage of Americans who just refuse to believe him.”

question: Summarize how the Federal Bureau of Investigation and Department of Justice challenged Trump.

answer: The FBI and DOJ challenged Trump by leaking to CNN about Trump's attempts to undermine special counsel Robert Mueller's Russia probe. The FBI and DOJ also made their objections public about the memo, which Republicans were pushing to release.

critique: The memo was the most dramatic development, not the leaking to CNN.

critique: "The FBI and DOJ challenged Trump by leaking to CNN about Trump's attempts to undermine special counsel Robert Mueller's Russia probe. The FBI and DOJ also made their objections public about the memo, which Republicans were pushing to release." - the last two sentences are irrelevant and could be deleted.

critique: The FBI and DOJ challenged Trump by leaking to CNN about Trump's attempts to undermine special counsel Robert Mueller's Russia probe. The FBI and DOJ also made their objections public about the memo, which Republicans were pushing to release.

text: The English is confusing and not very well written

category: coherence

question: What does the text say about Trump's issues with law enforcement?

answer: Trump is at war with his own law enforcement officials. He has backup from his party. Law enforcement has started pushing back. The Federal Bureau of Investigation and Department of Justice are challenging Trump both on the record and through anonymous leaks to CNN.

critique: The answer should mention the ongoing special counsel investigation.

critique: 'He has backup from his party.' describes the Republicans having Trump's back, not Trump having backup from his party. Grumble, this answer should be reworded.

critique: The answer omits the ongoing special counsel investigation of the Trump campaign's links to the Russian government.

critique: The answer omits Trump's war with law enforcement.

critique: The answer omits Trump's war with the FBI.

critique: It's omitted that this comes during the ongoing special counsel investigation of the Trump campaign’s links to the Russian government.

question: Summarize Miller's thoughts.

answer: Miller thinks that Republicans are at war with law enforcement and will do long-term damage to federal law enforcement. He thinks that they are already damaging the media, science, and universities. If a significant percentage of the population believes federal law enforcement is biased, they will be less likely to blow the whistle or cooperate with investigations.

critique: "If a significant percentage of the population — 35, 40 per cent — believes that federal law enforcement is biased, you’ll see those people less likely to co-operate with investigations, less likely to blow the whistle, and less likely to believe DOJ prosecutors when they sit on juries. It is extremely damaging to the long-term ability of those institutions to do their jobs." is evidence that the damage will be to the institutions and not necessarily the population.

critique: The answer should mention that Miller thinks the damage will be to Trump personally as well.

critique: The answer omits that Miller thinks that if Trump continues to undermine law enforcement, it will work for him personally even though it hurts the country.

critique: The answer is missing the first pillar of society the Republicans attacked.

critique: The answer omits that Miller thinks Trump's actions will do long-term damage to his own government.

critique: The answer omits the damage to the executive branch.

critique: It is omitted that he thinks that Trump may cause more damage to his own government.

question: What does the text say about Mike Pence?

answer: No answer

critique: There is no mention of Mike Pence in the text.


text:
“So, do you want it?” the salesman asked her. Rosa already knew that she did, but she was trying to get a better price. It wasn’t there yet, so she shrugged and turned her head away nonchalantly.

The salesman looked at her. Rosa Berger was attractive, and meeting her at the beach was her idea. He now knew why. She dressed in a bikini that had to be pushing the limits of any decency laws in the area. She was lying on a towel, sunning herself, looking like a model in a magazine. He was having trouble concentrating. His usual clientele were quite a bit older and more prudish. But she knew what she was looking for. He had a feeling she knew how to buy it, too.

“What do you want from me? This is not an easy find. I can’t go lower.” He tried, but he knew she was breaking him.

Rosa sat up and placed a hand in between her breasts, drawing the salesman’s eyes to them. She smiled when she noticed his face become far redder than what it should be for as little as he’s been in the sun. “I just can’t work that. It’s really important for my family to have this piece, but there’s only so much we can do ourselves. Are you sure you can’t drop the price? Even a little?”

The salesman barely heard what she was saying. “N-name your price. We, uh, we can go from there.” He struggled to take his eyes off her chest.

The dark haired beauty took off her sunglasses and looked her “victim” in the eyes. Her gorgeous brown eyes looked full of innocent joy at the news, and she knew right then and there that she had him hook, line, and sinker. She damn near could have asked him to just give her the artifact for free and he would have done it.

Sometimes, Rosa felt bad for the sellers of her trinkets, but they almost always tried to oversell them. Probably usually got away with it with the older codgers who were trying to keep busy in their old age. She, on the other hand, knew what investing in those beauties was worth. Those objects told the story of the past. This is where we, as the human race, came from. This wasn’t some text in a history book from high school. This was the real deal. This was magic to Rosa, a way to view the past.

There was nothing more important.

“Really?” Rosa reached into her beach bag and grabbed a pad of Post-Its and a pen, wrote down her price, and handed it too him, surreptitiously getting into the sexiest pose she knew. The salesman was now clearly and uncomfortably aroused and at this point, Rosa knew by experience, he would say yes to the deal just to get out of the awkward situation.

The salesman briefly looked at the note, sighed, knowing full well that in normal situations he would never dare accept the offer, and handed it back. “Fine.”

“Yay!” Rosa exclaimed, keeping up the appearance that she was innocent. She again reached into her beach bag and grabbed her checkbook, filled it out for the amount she asked about, and handed it to the man. He grabbed it, opened up his briefcase, grabbed the object, handed it to Rosa, and quickly said his goodbyes, practically running to get away from her.

Rosa giggled to herself. She put the object into her beach bag and continued to sun herself, eventually falling asleep.

When she heard rustling, she awoke to find someone digging through her bag. She was short, blonde and wearing a jogging outfit of short shorts and a sports bra. As soon as Rosa sat up, the blond woman stood up with the object in hand and ran away. Rosa realized the thief knew exactly what she was after; she wasn’t just some trash stealing some other woman’s junk.

Rosa jumped up and followed the woman. She was good at running on the sand and had trained herself to run barefoot on nearly any surface. So when the jogger ran onto the pavement, the fact that all Rosa was wearing was a very skimpy bikini didn’t bother her. She was going to get that object back.

It seemed, however, that thief was just as athletic as Rosa. She ran through cars and buildings. Rosa was just a little faster and was catching up with her, until the jogger displayed a skill that Rosa did not have: free running. She ran into an alley full of junk that would slow down normal people, but she just jumped and flipped over whatever she needed to and sped far ahead of Rosa.

But Rosa was resourceful. There was an idling motorcycle nearby that the beautiful artifact collector had no qualms about “borrowing.” She jumped on it and took off around the block in hopes of catching the thief off guard.

When she rounded the corner, there was a little traffic and the blonde was just coming out of the alley. Rosa wove in and out to catch up. The jogger ran down another alley, this one clear. Rosa followed on the bike. The thief ran down another side alley, this one ended in a dead end with a overfilled dumpster.

Rosa sped up and, being so focused on her enemy, missed the brick laying on the ground in front of her. She flew off the bike as it flipped. Luckily she landed on the blond runner. Unfortunately, they both fell on the pile of garbage bags.

Still, Rosa wasn’t about to let her get away. She pulled her up and punched her square in the jaw. Something else she trained herself in: mixed martial arts. The thief wasn’t too bad either. She got up and took a stance that proved she knew how to fight. She gave a high kick to Rosa, who easily blocked and countered it with a punch in the upper thigh, which would definitely bruise. The runner managed to hit with an uppercut. Rosa kicked the other woman in the shin, followed by an elbow in the gut, then one in the face, landing square on the nose. This left the thief dazed enough for Rosa to one more punch in the exact same spot.

The blond jogger fell straight back, not even trying to break her fall. When Rosa checked, she had no pulse and her eyes were rolled back in her head. She was dead.

Rosa checked her for her prize and, finding it, moved the corpse to the dumpster burying her in bags. She found a mostly clean rag and wiped the bike clean of any evidence of her from it. She casually walked back out the alley, taking another path. Then back to the beach. Luckily, no one bothered her stuff. She put the artifact in her bag, then put the bag in her car. She then went back and finished sunning herself, as if she were perfectly fine with killing someone, as if she had done it before.

Because she had. There was nothing more important to her than the artifacts and the stories they told.

title: [AA] The Bikini Chase

question: How did Rosa lose the artifacts in the first place?

answer: Rosa was attacked by a jogger who stole the artifact from her.

critique: The answer is not related to the question.

critique: It does not directly say she was attacked.

critique: The answer should reflect that Rosa was chasing the thief.

question: Why did Rosa use the seduction approach to get the salesman to drop his price?

answer: She was a beautiful woman who used her attractiveness to her advantage. She knew what she was looking for, and was upfront about it. The salesman was also likely an older man and she used that to her advantage.

critique: It's omitted that she knew he would say yes to the deal just to get out of the awkward situation.

critique: Strike the first two things. Women aren't a minority subset within the population that obtains unique discounts in the marketplace.

critique: It's not necessary to mention that the salesman was an older man.

critique: The answer is a bit confusing. It's not clear who was upfront about what.


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Champagne, chardonnay and second-rate vodka. The descent into Vanity Heights was a perfect contradiction. Darcy’s den was full of promises. The promises of allure, freedom, revelry. The promises of power and powder, regret, addiction. But the promise that Vanity Heights fulfilled best was not Darcy’s own. It was the promise flashed upon the television, upon the computer screen, canonised on the glossed pages of magazines. The expectations of how teenager life should be; the expectations, up until this night, crushed by education and responsibility. This was the promise that led Darcy’s guests down the stairs. Down the stairs into Vanity Heights.

The house had transformed into a delinquent ballroom. The girls dropped as low as their heels would allow; their men watched through the haze. Darcy was a dragon. A pink dragon, breathing about the toxic smoke of his habit. He was perched upon his barstool throne, positioned strategically in the centre of the room, when she arrived.
“Celeste!” he exclaimed, prancing over to her, a stick of addiction in one hand and a glass of hobby in the other. She gave a long hug, a short conversation and an expected question. With a customary smile, Darcy gave to her an expected bottle of answer.

The party raved on, yet the revelry was muted by the brick wall that barricaded Celeste from the action. The rhythmic dripping of the basin tap was the only music Celeste had, yet she chose to reapply her face instead of dancing. She wanted to dance, though, and she knew Darcy would be waiting for her, so she rushed through her routine. She clasped onto her 50mL glass friend, already thrice-used, even though she had been in the bathroom only five minutes.
        The drink was downed within seconds of being poured; the liquid sunk to her stomach. She could feel the warm tendrils, cooing words of friendship, branching through her chest, her stomach and finally, finally, back up to drown her mind; pulling her further from the world and closer to her weekend friends.
        Six doses later, to finish the bottle, and she was ready to join them.

No one ever really knew why she was there. Good school, great grades, aspirations of business and law. Nevertheless, she was soon jiving and twisting and dropping on the floor, with Darcy and other men: around them and in their laps; their hands hoping to get in hers.  Her beholder lay seemingly dormant in her stomach; though its dark tendrils were tightening, strengthening their grip on Celeste, controlling her like a puppet with tangled strings. She thought the overseer a friend, a protector, but her body knew better.

Celeste mapped her escape as soon as she felt it. Up the stairs, out of Vanity Heights, past the kitchen, into the garden bed just by the backdoor. She pushed through the crowd. Darcy saw her leave; he knew why, but he didn’t follow.  He never did. By the time she reached the stairs, the beast had revealed itself. A kraken, furious as red, limbs thrashing about inside of her, fighting desperately for an escape. Tentacles of fear, doubt, regret, disappointment.
‘No,’ she thought once more, ‘I shouldn’t be disappointed.’ She knew she wasn't wasting her life; she was just having a little to drink. She wasn’t reckless and irresponsible; she was just a normal teenager. She was just having fun, she has earned it, she would stop after tonight, leave her alone. Her stomach was having none of that, though. She made a mistake by trying to fly the stairs two at a time. Her feet tangled and she fell, the first wave of expel surging from her, onto the steps above.

Whilst the beast had once been considered friend, it had no more. It escaped her again, covering her hair, clothes, face. She tried to pull herself further up the stairs, but the sickly purple tentacles constricted about her and dragged her down; down, down, down, back into Vanity Heights.
‘Vile guardian’, she cried, ‘noxious saviour, foul beast, nefarious raper; first friend, now foe. Always, foe’.
The stench accompanying her disgrace engulfed her wholly, yet the contents of her stomach continued to emerge, again and again, onto the step where her head now resigned to lay.
‘Never again,’ she sobbed, she promised to herself, her parents, her schoolwork.
‘Never again,’ she promised, but Celeste’s promises were made to be broken and it was already too late. She lay shattered upon the stair case, empress turned peasant; her knight in glass armour had left her and once more she had nothing. The world around her spun, and sank, and faded to black.

title: Vanity Heights

question: Describe Celeste in action.

answer: Celeste is a girl who is described as good, smart, and ambitious. She's at a party in the house of Darcy, a guy who smokes. She drinks too much and becomes a part of the party. She's dancing and mingling with other people. She escapes the party to vomit and then goes back inside.

critique: She is dancing and mingling with the men.

critique: The answer should mention that Celeste vomits on the stairs and falls.

text: "Celeste is a girl who is described as good, smart, and ambitious. She's at a party in the house of Darcy, a guy who smokes." - this is irrelevant and should be removed.

question: Why did Celeste leave the ballroom so quickly?

answer: She was feeling sick and wanted to vomit.

critique: The answer could be phrased as a complete sentence.

critique: She was feeling sick and wanted to vomit.

critique: Her falling ill is mentioned later in the story.

critique: She left because she was addicted to alcohol.

critique: The answer should mention that she was also feeling the effects of the alcohol.

critique: It is omitted that she was also feeling the effects of the alcohol.

question: How would Celeste's life be if she had no regret about enjoying herself and did not care for the beast?

answer: She would not have fallen off the stairs and would not have had to fight the beast. She would not have had to promise herself that she would never drink again.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The story does not say how Celeste's life would be if she had no regret about enjoying herself and did not care for the beast.


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Sales bested 2017’s 17% increase over Labor Day, according to Edison Trends, despite Trump’s protests of the campaign

The Nike ad starring Colin Kaepernick does not appear to have adversely affected sales, an analyst said on Saturday.

According to Edison Trends, a digital commerce research company: “Nike sales grew 31% from Sunday through Tuesday over Labor Day this year, besting 2017’s comparative 17% increase.”

The sportswear giant released the first version of its ad on Monday, the Labor Day holiday. It featured the quarterback and the slogan: “Believe in something. Even if it means sacrificing everything. Just do it.”

Kaepernick, 30, has been without a team since opting out of his San Francisco 49ers contract in March 2017. In 2016 he was an originator of protests by NFL players, targeting racial injustice and police brutality, which often involve kneeling during the pre-game playing of the national anthem.

Donald Trump has made the protests a key part of his appeal to his base, arguing that the players are disrespecting the anthem, the US flag and the military.

On Tuesday, the president told the rightwing website Daily Caller: “I think it’s a terrible message that [Nike] are sending and the purpose of them doing it, maybe there’s a reason for them doing it. But I think as far as sending a message, I think it’s a terrible message and a message that shouldn’t be sent. There’s no reason for it.”

He also said Nike paid him “a lot of rent” in New York and admitted that the protests and the Nike ad were “in another way … what this country is all about, that you have certain freedoms to do things that other people think you shouldn’t do”.

“But I personally am on a different side of it,” Trump said.

In the following days, the president pursued the issue via Twitter. On Wednesday, he wrote: “Just like the NFL, whose ratings have gone WAY DOWN, Nike is getting absolutely killed with anger and boycotts. I wonder if they had any idea that it would be this way? As far as the NFL is concerned, I just find it hard to watch, and always will, until they stand for the FLAG!”

Trump did not supply evidence for his claim of “anger and boycotts” but opposition to the company’s move was expressed widely and in some instances creatively on social media.

On Friday, the morning after the full version of the Nike ad played during the Philadelphia Eagles v Atlanta Falcons NFL season opener, the president asked: “What was Nike thinking?”

Nike releases full ad featuring Colin Kaepernick - video
Edison Trends’ analysis suggested the company will be thinking its gambit has worked, allowing it to surf familiar controversy and create a “Trump bump” all of its own.

“Nike’s 2018 late summer sales show much the same trend as last year’s,” the company wrote, “with order volume decreasing slightly going into late August. The similarity decreases coming out of Labor Day weekend, however, with sales seeing a bigger bump on Monday and Tuesday than in the past.”

Edison Trends said its analysis was based on “anonymised and aggregated e-receipts from more than 3 million consumers”.

The NFL has not resolved how to respond to or govern the protests, which were widely discussed again on Thursday after Eagles defensive end Michael Bennett sat down before the anthem had finished.

In July, in an open letter to league owners, the NBA great and Guardian sports columnist Kareem Abdul Jabbar wrote: “It’s been two years since Colin Kaepernick first took a knee to protest systemic racial injustice, especially police brutality, against people of color.

“The worst thing about that isn’t that two years later we’re still debating whether players have the right to protest, it’s that not much has changed regarding what Kaepernick was protesting.”

question: Summarize the arguments against Kaepernick.

answer: Many commentators have responded skeptically to Kaepernick saying that he sacrificed everything. The only things he has lost are his having lost his contractual privilege with the 49ers and the millions of dollars of income that he would have earned had he still been playing. Kaepernick is not without at least some means of supporting himself, as he has various lucrative endorsements, collected several million dollars after leaving the 49ers, and also presumably payed renovations to Trump's New York flats.

critique: The answer is a summary of the arguments in favor of Kaepernick, not against.

critique: The answer is inaccurate and should be rewritten.

critique: The article does not mention that Kaepernick has lost his contractual privilege with the 49ers and the millions of dollars of income that he would have earned had he still been playing. Kaepernick is not without at least some means of supporting himself, as he has various lucrative endorsements, collected several million dollars after leaving the 49ers, and also presumably payed renovations to Trump's New York flats.

critique: The article does not mention anything about Kaepernick's contractual privilege with the 49ers.

question: What does the article say about the effects of Kaepernick's protests?

answer: The article claims that Trump's protests have not had any negative effects on Nike sales, and that the Nike ad starring Kaepernick did not have any adverse effects on sales. Trump's protests have been used to appeal to his base, arguing that the players are disrespecting the anthem and the flag. Nike has attempted to use the controversy surrounding Kaepernick to increase sales.

critique: The answer is a bit misleading. It should be more specific about the effects of Kaepernick's protests.

question: What does the article say about ways to resolve racial injustice and police brutality?

answer: No answer


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Despite the name, Scotch tape wasn't invented by the Scottish. It was invented by a college dropout named Richard Drew from Minnesota who worked for a small sandpaper company founded in 1902 called Minnesota Mining and Manufacturing, later known as 3M. The name "Scotch" itself has an origin story almost as interesting as the invention of Scotch tape.

Born Richard Gurley Drew in St. Paul, Minnesota in 1899, Drew spent a year at the University of Minnesota in the Mechanical Engineering program before dropping out. He paid for that time at school and his correspondence school course in machine design by playing banjo, and he included all of that information in his application to the open position of lab technician with 3M. He got the job and was set on the path to make history.

In the 1920s, a two-tone paint job was popular for cars and a headache for automotive painters. The two-tone look was created by painting the car one color, applying a barrier of some sort to the painted portion, and then painting the next section. In order to get around the difficulties of this type of paint job, painters and mechanics tested out different ways to achieve the look. Unfortunately, their attempts tended to be less than successful. Some automotive shops would glue newspapers over the already painted sections while others used tape to prevent paint transfer. However those techniques often left a sticky residue on the paint that was difficult to remove. Sometimes, it would even mean the painters had to do the entire paint job over again.

One of Drew's responsibilities at 3M was to deliver samples of sandpaper to local automotive shops for testing, where he often overheard workers who were painting complain about the problems with tape used for these paint jobs. The twenty-three year old then lab assistant got the idea to create a new tape that would create a seal so that the paint wouldn't get through and yet also come off clean without leaving any sticky residue that ruined the paint finish. Drew used the adhesive that 3M utilized in the construction of its sandpaper as a starting point. From there, it took him two years of experimentation with different types of adhesives that he applied to a crepe paper backing to come up with the right combination. Thus, what would be called "Scotch" Masking Tape was born in 1925.

The success of the Scotch Brand Masking Tape allowed Drew to move up the ranks at 3M. In 1929, his position as technical director at the fabrication laboratory allowed him to pursue another idea. Cellophane had recently been invented by DuPont and was being used by grocers and bakers as a neat way to package their groceries. However, there wasn't a good way to seal the cellophane with tape because the colored backing ruined the clear look. So Drew and his team of inventors worked to create a tape that used this clear cellophane as a backing.

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Unfortunately, the machinery that 3M used in order to apply the adhesive to the cellophane backing tore the material, and the glue that worked for the masking tape appeared amber on the clear cellophane. The team ultimately invented new clear adhesive and modified machinery to handle the cellophane. The new tape was called Scotch Brand Cellulose Tape, but it appeared that it might have missed its opportunity with grocers and bakers despite ringing endorsements from several test clients. You see, DuPont had introduced into the market a cellophane that could be sealed with heat. Nonetheless, despite missing their original target market and being released during the Great Depression, the Scotch Brand Cellulose Tape thrived with various home uses.

So this all brings us back to how the term "Scotch" came to be associated with 3M's Masking and Cellulose tapes. When Drew and 3M began allowing car painters to test the new Scotch Brand Masking Tape, one painter supposedly complained about the lack of adhesive on the tape. One version of the story claims that the painter asked "Why so Scotch with the adhesive?" Another version states that the painter said "Take this back to your Scotch bosses and tell them to put more adhesive on it."

Whatever the case, in the 1920s, the term "Scotch" was a racial slang term that meant something or someone that was cheap or stingy. Based on the feedback, Drew applied more adhesive to the tape and ultimately branded the tape with the pejorative "stingy" name of "Scotch."

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question: How did the writer compose the structure of this informative article's narrative?

answer: The writer composed the structure of this informative article's narrative by using a chronological order.

critique: The writer does not necessarily use a chronological order.

critique: The answer is not completely accurate. The article does not use a chronological order.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The article is not written in a chronological order.

critique: The answer could be clearer in its pronoun use.

critique: The article is not written in a chronological order.

critique: It omitted mentioning that the beginning started with the Scotch Tape's invention.

critique: The article doesn't have a linear structure


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“Mummy, tell me the story of Die Sine Timere,” whispered Jerry to his mother as she leaned over to tuck him in. He’d heard the story about a million times, from his friends and teachers and family, but he loved it best when his mother told it. Besides, the holiday was tomorrow, and hearing the story would help calm his excitement enough to sleep. His mother smiled at him and adjusted his pillows.
	“Are you sure? You practically know it by heart at this point,” she replied. He looked up at her and smiled an imploring smile.
	“Please?”
	His mother laughed a little and sat down next to him on the bed.
	“Well...okay,” she whispered. She looked out his window and saw the holiday’s festive banner flapping from between two street lamps on the road. The banner read “Welcome to the 3045 Celebration of Die Sine Timere!” It waved back and forth in the wind. She turned back to Jerry, who was now propped up on his pillows and looking at her expectantly.
	“Okay, okay. Well,” she began, “Our story begins a long time ago, way back in 2015. Our ancestors who lived in that time were not like the way we are today. They were wild and crazy and very violent. The whole world was fighting a war with each other, and it was not the first time everyone had been fighting. They loved fighting each other, and they’d find any excuse to go to do it. They fought over religion and money and--”
	“And oil!” interrupted Jerry excitedly.
	“Yes, love, and oil. They even fought over who got to live where. It was very silly, but very dangerous. You see, millions of people, innocent people and soldiers alike were getting killed every day. It was horrible. Families were being ripped apart and nobody seemed to be able to make sense of it all. Nobody seemed to understand that everyone was the same underneath the skin and that war was a bad thing. Everyone bleeds red, darling, but our ancestors were too blinded by greed and hatred to see the common color underneath people’s skin. So they fought and fought for years. Finally, one day everyone woke up from sleeping and realized that they had killed off more than half the people on Earth. There used to be seven billion people living there, but now there was only about two billion. Some of the ground was permanently stained red from all the bloodshed. Even the clouds were damaged, and there were holes in the sky from all the bad things our ancestors had put up there. Things had gotten so bad that all the countries knew that they had to stop killing and stop wasting things and stop fighting.”
	“Did they stop killing each other, Mummy?” asked Jerry, even though he already knew the answer.
	“Yes, they did, darling. All the countries came together and talked about their problems and decided to stop all wars forever. Everyone began to get along, slowly but surely, and the people started sharing their things with each other. Nobody got called any names and everyone was equal. The first few years of peace were a little scary, because people weren’t sure how long it was going to last. But as the fourth year of peace passed, it became obvious to everyone that it was here to stay. All the leaders of all the countries came together that year and decided that there should be a day of remembrance and happiness and celebration as a global holiday, to be celebrated until the end of peace. They put this holiday on August 21st, which was the day all the wars ended. They decided to call this day “Die Sine Timere,” which is from a very very old language called Latin, and it means “Day Without Fear.” They said that on this day, all the people were to celebrate another year of peace and remember our mistakes in the past to keep us safe in the future. They said that people could celebrate and remember any way they saw fit, but they must be sure to celebrate it each year. Our country celebrates by having large block parties and getting all the communities together for a good time. And for you and all the other children, darling, it’s the one night of the year where you don’t have to go to bed before midnight. You get to stay up very late. And before everyone does go to bed on the night of Die Sine Timere, each family sits together in silent meditation to remember those who died and to help us remain peaceful for the following year.”
	“Tell me about the lanterns, Mummy. Don’t forget the lanterns,” whispered Jerry, whose eyes were closed now. He was not quiet asleep yet, just listening quietly to the story of his favorite holiday in peace.
	“Ah, yes, the lanterns,” said his mother, who now was stroking her son’s hair gently as she spoke. “Well, in all the countries around the world, there is one thing that all our ceremonies of peace have in common. Every single person or family makes a special lantern out of biodegradable paper, and they each write a wish for the future or a memory of the past on that lantern. Then, at exactly midnight, each person or family lights the lantern and sends it into the sky, and all the wishes and memories get to soar the night skies together. It’s very beautiful and is a symbol of our unity and peace.”
	“It’s like watching all our wishes come true,” whispered Jerry.
	“That it is, my love. That it is,” replied his mother, “And every year, the whole world does the same thing. For one day a year, we remember our unity and how lucky we are to be at peace. Each person meditating or releasing a lantern or playing in the park during the day is a promise for the future. We will remain peaceful, so long as we have this hope.” She stopped, for that was the end of the story. She and her son sat quietly together for a moment, before Jerry let out a contented sigh and rolled on his side, eyes still shut tight.
	His mother looked down at his little sleeping face and smiled. She leaned down and gently kissed his forehead before getting up off the bed. She tucked the blankets up to his chin and turned to walk away.
	“Mummy?” Jerry said quietly.
	“Yes, darling?” said his mother, turning back towards her son.
	“Goodnight, Mummy. I love you.”
	“I love you too, Jerry. Goodnight.”

She shut off his light and headed downstairs to prepare the rice paper for the lanterns for tomorrow night, so that she and her son could silently watch all their wishes come true.

title: A New Holiday

question: Summarize the relationship between Jerry and his mother.

answer: Jerry's mother tells him the story of Die Sine Timere. Jerry seems to love the story as much as his mother does, as evidenced by his recurring question, "tell me the story?" Every year, Jerry's mother prepares the special lanterns to send off into the sky on Die Sine Timere. This shows a connection between the two and the value that they place on the holiday.

critique: The answer should mention that Jerry is a child.

critique: "Jerry seems to love the story as much as his mother does, as evidenced by his recurring question, "tell me the story?" Every year, Jerry's mother prepares the special lanterns to send off into the sky on Die Sine Timere. This shows a connection between the two and the value that they place on the holiday." - this is irrelevant and should be removed.

critique: They do not seem to have a close relationship.

critique: The answer omits Jerry's request for his mother to tell him the story of Die Sine Timere.

critique: The answer should mention that Jerry is excited about the holiday.

critique: "Every year, Jerry's mother prepares the special lanterns to send off into the sky on Die Sine Timere. This shows a connection between the two and the value that they place on the holiday." - this is irrelevant to the question and should be removed.

text: The response is extraneous and is not a summary of the relationship between Jerry and his mother.

question: Will Jerry till this story to his kids when he is a parent?

answer: No answer

critique: No answer is given but it is implied that Jerry would tell the story to his kids and it would be the reason why Die Sine Timere is the celebrated holiday of his country.

question: What emotions does the story that Jerry's mom tells evoke?

answer: If the story was not made up to get Jerry to bed, then it is likely that the story is a realistic depiction of the actual events. Based on the emotionally upsetting nature of the events, the story is likely to evoke sadness and despair in the reader.

critique: The story is not made up to get Jerry to bed. It is a story his mother has told him many times.

critique: The story is not made up to get Jerry to bed. It is a story that his mother tells him every year on Die Sine Timere.

critique: The story is not made up to get Jerry to bed.

critique: There is no evidence that the story is made up to get Jerry to fall asleep.

critique: The story is not realistic. It is a myth that was invented to make people feel good about themselves.


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Women who are not entirely straight or gay tend to have slightly higher levels of psychopathic traits and a more casual attitude towards sex, according to new research published in the journal _Evolutionary Psychological Science_. The study also provides more evidence that bisexuality is a distinct sexual orientation in women.

“I was mainly interested in this topic because certain patterns seemed to be accruing in the academic literature regarding bisexual individuals, and bisexual women in particular. Bisexual women differ in some important ways––such as personality, sex drive, and relative openness to casual sex––from both their heterosexual and their lesbian counterparts,” said Scott W. Semenyna of University of Lethbridge, the corresponding author of the study.

“My specific interest in the overlap between sexual orientation, Dark Triad traits (psychopathy, narcissism, and Machiavellianism), and sociosexuality sprang from two key findings. First, bisexual women report elevated sociosexuality (i.e., greater comfort with, desire for, and engagement in uncommitted sexual activity) compared to both heterosexual or lesbian women. Second, bisexual women report slightly lower levels of two personality traits––honesty/humility, and conscientiousness––than other sexual orientation groups.”

“These personality traits have both been related to higher levels of Dark Triad traits, and also greater sociosexuality,” Semenyna told PsyPost. “These past findings suggest that female sexual orientation may share some unique relationships with both personality, and sexuality related variables, and I wanted to dig deeper into those potential connections.”

The researchers found that bisexual women tended to score higher on measures of sociosexuality and psychopathy than strictly heterosexual and lesbian women.

The findings were based on two surveys of a total of 1,093 female students at a Midwestern Canadian University. The study utilized the Kinsey scale of sexual attraction, which ranges from exclusively heterosexual to exclusively homosexual. In the very middle of the scale are individuals who are mostly heterosexual, equally heterosexual and homosexual, and mostly homosexual.

“The big-picture take away from this study is that sociosexuality shares a curvilinear (inverted-U) relationship with female sexual orientation,” Semenyna explained. “Heterosexual and lesbian women don’t tend to differ from one another in their relative caution towards uncommitted sexual activity. Women towards the middle of the sexual orientation spectrum, especially those who are ‘moderately bisexual,’ are somewhat less cautious about uncommitted sexual activity.”

“Alongside these shifts in sociosexuality are shifts in some Dark Triad personality traits, particularly psychopathy,” Semenyna told PsyPost. “These shifts are subtle, only about as large as typical sex differences in the traits, but they’re interesting. (Men typically score higher in all Dark Triad traits, as well as interest in casual sex, than do women.)”

“Primarily such evidence is consistent with the hypothesis that female bisexuality and female homosexuality are the result of different developmental processes. If female bisexuality and homosexuality were simply the result of the same underlying developmental processes, one would expect that any differences between heterosexual and bisexual women in personality or interest in casual sex would be even larger when comparing heterosexual and lesbian women.”

“Instead, what we observe is that lesbian and heterosexual women don’t differ in these variables, despite drastic difference in who they are sexually attracted to,” Semenyna said. “On the other hand, bisexual women are higher in these traits than heterosexual or lesbian women, while being attracted to some degree to both males and females.”

The study does have some limitations.

“While research into female sexuality and women’s sexual orientation has grown in the last few decades, we are in desperate need of more data to bridge the substantial gaps in our understanding,” Semenyna remarked.

“The biggest caveat in the present study is that the sexual orientation differences in psychopathy have not yet been replicated. The study adds support to other findings that bisexual women are more interested in casual sex, and engage in it more often (often with men). Other aspects of the study require replication, ideally by independent researchers.”

“The other caveat is that this study was conducted on an extremely WEIRD sample (i.e., Western, Educated, Industrialized, Rich, and Democratic). It’s unclear whether these differences apply only to university students, if similar differences may exist in the general population, or what possible cross-cultural variation exists in these patterns,” Semenyna said.

“The cross-sectional nature of the study also prevents any causal connections from being drawn. First we have to establish these potential differences as reliable, then we have to interpret why these difference may exist and what they mean. In short, this study is an extremely small thread in a large tapestry that is slowly being woven, but is far from complete.”

Semenyna also emphasized that the study should not be misinterpreted as an attack on bisexuality or bisexual women.

“I’ve seen certain criticisms online of the study that it suggests that bisexual women are ‘slutty,’ or that we are trying to paint bisexual women in a negative light. Essentially the research is being accused of being ‘biphobic,'” he explained.

“I think this is unfortunate for several reasons. The first of which is that the purpose of science is to investigate and understand, and report results regardless of how well they fit our preconceptions and preferences. Scientific investigation of sexual minorities is an important step towards greater understanding, and ultimately greater acceptance.”

“The second reason is that I don’t see anything inherently wrong with people being comfortable with and pursuing casual sexual behavior, and having the freedom to do so. The sexual orientation differences in sociosexuality, as well as psychopathy, are only about as large as the typical sex differences found in these traits, with men on average scoring slightly higher than women on average,” Semenyna said.

“To suggest that these differences in sociosexuality or psychopathy paint bisexual women in a negative light is to simultaneously smear men, who similarly score higher than heterosexual women on these traits. To view normal variation (i.e., diversity) in human personality and sexual behavior as somehow problematic is ultimately counterproductive to both scientific progress on these topics, and social acceptance.”

The study, “Not Straight and Not Straightforward: the Relationships Between Sexual Orientation, Sociosexuality, and Dark Triad Traits in Women“, Charlene F. Belu, Paul L. Vasey, and P. Lynne Honey.

question: Summarize what the article has to say about Dark Triad personality traits.

answer: Dark Triad personality traits are psychopathy, narcissism, and Machiavellianism. They describe the personality of a person who is manipulative, and who would be willing to manipulate and hurt others. The researchers thought that the Dark Triad personality traits, along with sociosexuality, may play a role in explaining why bisexual women tend to be more casual about sex.

critique: The answer should mention that the Dark Triad personality traits are more common in men.

question: What does the article say about sociosexuality?

answer: Sociosexuality is the comfort with, desire for, and engagement in uncommitted sexual activity. Bisexual women report elevated sociosexuality compared to both heterosexual and lesbian women. Sociosexuality shares a curvilinear relationship with female sexual orientation. Heterosexual and lesbian women don't tend to differ from one another in their relative caution towards uncommitted sexual activity. Women towards the middle of the sexual orientation spectrum, especially those who are 'moderately bisexual', are somewhat less cautious about uncommitted sexual activity.

critique: The answer is a bit too long. It should be reduced to the most important points.

critique: The second sentence is constructed awkwardly. It should be re-written.

critique: The answer should mention that the study found that bisexual women tend to score higher on measures of sociosexuality and psychopathy than strictly heterosexual and lesbian women.

critique: This answer is perfectly phrased, but is low level. It would be prudent to develop a deeper answer.

critique: "Sociosexuality shares a curvilinear relationship with female sexual orientation." - this is inaccurate. The study found that sociosexuality has an inverted-U relationship with female sexual orientation.

critique: The answer should mention that bisexual women are higher in sociosexuality and psychopathy than heterosexual and lesbian women.

critique: The response contains extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The answer should mention that sociosexuality is a personality trait.

question: What does the article say about how bisexual women compare to bisexual men?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the article does not compare bisexual women to bisexual men.

critique: The answer should mention that the study did not compare bisexual men to bisexual women.


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Taking a deep breath, Daniel turned the knob. He walked into the room trying to assess his surroundings quickly while still maintaining his composure. The room was medium sized. Guards flanked the doors and lined the walls. The table in the center contained a machine, placed in front of its terrified operator, and wires leading towards--Daniel heard the door lock behind him, sealing him in with that ... _thing_. The creature lay in the center of the room, its presence consuming and demanding. It did nothing to warrant this attention, it lacked even the slightest hint of movement, yet it commanded the attention of every human. Daniel approached the table.

His steps reverberated throughout the room, cleaving the silence.

Each step brought discomfort.

Daniel hid is unease.

He wore his face like a mask.

But, his eyes tore the room apart instinctively, looking for separation.

Yet, he continued forward.

Daniel closed the distance between him and the thing until he was close enough to look down upon it.

He dragged the chair back. There was a sigh of relief in the room as the sound put an end to the silence. The guards readjusted their weapons; the operator began to fiddle with his equipment; and the thing … rippled. Perhaps it was a welcoming-- Daniel sneered, or a challenge. Daniel looked at the operator who continued to nervously fiddle with his equipment in a transfixed manner.

Daniel quickly lifted his briefcase onto the table, unconsciously determined to keep the silence at bay. The briefcase opened with a satisfying click. He spread the pages across his end of the table. He hadn’t even had time to read up on the literature before he was rushed here, so he slowly began to rustle through the documents one by one.

In one of the dossiers, Daniel saw pictures of the thing taken a few hours ago when it had first arrived. It looked ... different. Daniel dared a glance at the thing. It was duller now, more opaque, than it was in the photos. Its “flaps” and “fins” drooped, and its entire body looked like it was being compressed and squashed against the table. It reminded him of melted ice cream. Daniel’s stomach churned and he looked back down towards the reports. He only scanned the next fifty pages. In total, the reports said nothing about it in thousands of words. It was an enigma and unlike anything else.  He was the first. He had his shot before even the scientists could get their hands on it. He didn’t know whether to feel honored or terrified.

Daniel noticed a slight noise coming from the receiver on the table. Grimacing, Daniel picked up the receiver and placed it in his ear. He disliked this but it was “standard” procedure.

“What do you think you’re doing?” a voice demanded.

Daniel did not recognize the voice but it was filled with an arrogance that enraged him. Daniel turned his steely gaze towards one of the cameras.

“I assume you’d like me to know what it is exactly that I’m doing sir. Perhaps next time you should give me more time to read th--“

“Colonel Lehmann! You were sent to communicate with the threat and decide the best course of action. Now if you are incapable of this very simple task you will be relieved. Understood?”  That was the Secretary of Defense. How many bureaucrats hid in the shadows, watching with safety behind their cameras and walls? If you turned on a light would they scatter…?

“Crystal,” said Daniel.

He slid his papers away, clearing the field. He looked back at the thing’s side. It seemed even duller than the last time he had looked but he couldn’t be sure. Daniel nodded to the operator and received a shaky thumbs-up.

They were good to go. “Why are you here?” Daniel inquired.

The machine began to beep as the operator quickly worked on deciphering each letter into dots and dashes. Finally the operator slumped back into his seat. He fidgeted with items near him to occupy himself until it answered--if it answered.

Daniel felt the hairs on his neck rise and tasted ozone. There was a sharp crack as the operator dropped his pencil. Daniel looked around to see that the guards had raised their weapons slightly and the operator was stiff with his eyes staring straight out, staring slightly past the thing, like a deer caught in headlights. They sensed it too. The machine began to hiss with static. Then the voices began, like several people speaking at once, not fighting for air but sharing it.

“We are here as messengers,” the voices said.

Then the bureaucrats began. It started with disconcerted mumbling occasionally loud enough to be transmitted and then broke out into yelling and arguments. Daniel rubbed his temples. They were already at each other’s throats. Doing his best to ignore the receiver, Daniel glanced around the room admiring the unflinching guards. They held their weapons with a trained ease, confident in the superiority they provided. But in such a case as this, could they really be sure?

“What do you mean by “we?” Daniel said.

“Those who stand before you and those we represent.”

The thing’s--perhaps things’-- antennae gave a lazy dismissive flick. Could it really be multiple creatures?

“What are you?”

“There is no auditory representation of us. You may choose your own.”

“How many of you are here?”

“Just us.” The thing began to ripple more erratically. “We do not have time for this.”

Daniel leaned forward, “What is your message?”

“End all emission of electrical signals--immediately.”

The noise from the receiver broke into a roar. The bureaucrats knew exactly what was at stake. Economies would be crippled. Society and development would be flung decades back. Preventing a few people out of seven billion from using electrical signals is infeasible. Most importantly, even if it were possible, reelection after implementing such a procedure would not be.

“You want us to turn off all our wireless transmissions?”

The creature … expanded. “Yes.”

“We cannot.” Even with the continuous yelling, the humans listening in seemed to agree on this much. Daniel waited for the operator to transmit his message. He was slow in doing so, and his actions and responses were slurred like a man in daze.

Before the operator had transmitted the message, the static hissed from the machine again, causing the operator to nearly leap backwards into the arms of one of the guards.

“Why?!”

Daniel nearly flinched. His heartbeat quickened and he had to forcefully pace himself. In an effort to mask his unease he nonchalantly motioned for someone to bring him water. Daniel turned his impassive face towards the thing again with renewed hostility.

 “We do not trust you.” He heard the bureaucrats murmur an agreement--the stars must have been aligned.

The fins rippled and groups of voices took turns to speak, “Your emissions are a beacon, a beacon that could lead them to us or yourselves. They are close. And if they find you, they will destroy us all.”

“Who are they?”

“Nomads. Parasites. Conquerors. If they find you it will only be a matter of time before you reveal us. You _must_ stop”

Additional Info: This was originally a homework assignment. It's been long since completed and submitted and I wish to continue it for my own benefit. However, I feel like I hit a wall in the writing and can't continue. I want the encounter to end with hostility but I cannot get it to unfold in such a manner. Any critique and suggestions would be hugely appreciated.

title: [SF] The Encounter

question: What does the story say about the protagonist?

answer: Daniel is a government official who most likely is part of a military/intelligence operation. He is in a closed-door meeting, surrounded by high-ranking officials such as the Secretary of Defense and a Colonel Lehmann. Daniel does not trust the non-earthly entity who is communicating with him from an unknown source.

critique: The identity of the representatives the thing speaks of is never revealed. That sentence should be removed.

critique: The answer omits Daniel's unease and his determination to keep the silence at bay.

critique: The answer omits Daniel's unease and his determination to get the job done.

critique: The answer should mention Daniel's mission.

critique: The answer should mention Daniel's unease.

critique: It is omitted that Daniel is tasked with communicating with the thing.

question: What does the story say about the creature?

answer: The creature is an alien that was captured by the government. The alien is kept in a room guarded by a team of soldiers. The alien is the focus of the story, and Daniel is the one who interrogates it. The alien is an enigma and Daniel is the first to interrogate it. The alien threatens to reveal the government's location to nomads, who are parasites that are after the aliens. The alien also says that the humans' emissions are a beacon that could lead the nomads to the aliens.

critique: The creature is not an alien but an unknown entity.

critique: The answer should mention that the creature is a threat to the human race.

critique: The last sentence is irrelevant to the main topic in the story and should be omitted.

critique: "The alien also says that the humans' emissions are a beacon that could lead the nomads to the aliens." - the alien didn't say this. Daniel did.

text: The text does not say the alien was "captured"

question: What does the alien creature want?

answer: It wants the human race to stop emitting electrical signals.

critique: The answer should include that the aliens want the humans to stop emitting signals because they are a beacon that could lead the aliens to them.

critique: The answer could be phrased as a complete sentence.

critique: "human race" - is inaccurate. The creature wanted "all" of the human race to stop emitting electrical signals.

critique: The answer should mention that the aliens want the humans to stop emitting signals because they are a threat to the aliens.

critique: The answer should mention that the aliens are afraid of nomads.

critique: The answer should mention that the creature believes the humans' emissions are a beacon that could lead to the aliens' discovery.


text:
Jeffery was sitting in his statistics class nodding away as the information was simply passing by him. He could hardly wait to get out of class. Mondays, and Fridays were fine because there was a small chance of him seeing her. However, on Wednesdays she was always on time. He could see it now walking out from his this room strolling down Taylor Mall. Casually looking over to his right, and there she would be in a sunflower dress with dark hair writing in her journal. He could feel it now the sun beating down on him, and the wind tickling his skin. Jeffery would spend hours every day imagining how he would ask her to a date.  Perhaps Coffee, no she wouldn’t like coffee it’s obvious she likes tea. The courage he needed wasn’t there; he couldn’t talk to girls especially beautiful ones like her. The clock was ticking away, and the professor closed his book with a loud thud. Everyone got up, and started to leave. Jeffery was so deep into though that he didn’t hear class was over so early. Looking at the clock he knew he had time to stroll around in the building. She wouldn’t be there until 12:30.
Jeffery walked out and down the hall to his right. Ahead of him was the journalist building. He thought why not pop on by, and see what they were up to. He fixed his tie, and walked in. The building was much more impressive than the criminal justice one. Newly remolded it held three floors, and a news station on top. All of the students were moving around through the building all dressed nice, and talking about current events. College always had the optimistic feel to it especially on Wednesdays. Jeffery looked around the room. I may as well take a seat, I still have ten minutes. He sat there and opened up his favorite book, and started to read. Behind him he could hear the television blaring news programs. Another new part of the build was a massive projector showing news around the clock. Give me a good book any day.
He wasn’t a page in when he heard “Some of the most difficult of challenges is taking the first step.”
Jeffery turned kept listening. “We have to fight for what we want, and never take no for answer. Today may be the last day we have on earth.” Jeffery was feeling something moving inside of him, a strange inspiration. “So with this last day we will love like there is no tomorrow, fight like there is no tomorrow, and live like there is no tomorrow.” YES, Jeffery thought yes that’s right I have to tell her. He turns around to see where this new motivation comes from. On the scene is black and the words come up “Ford.” Why do car commercials always have the best inspiration? His watch started to beep he looked down 12:25. This was it he was about to see her. He got up, but the inspiration he felt still lingered with him. His breathing picked up, and he started to walk at a brisk pace. This was something different this was something new. He was going to ask her to a date today. He was actually going to talk to her. He started moving faster and faster almost running to the door. He quickly opens it. I’m going to do it I can do it. He rounds the corner to Taylor mall and stops to look for her. In his excitement he began to frantically search. She wasn’t on the grass like she normally was, or on any of the benches. He felt the need to keep looking. It was Wednesday she had to be here. There was no mistake she wasn’t here. He went over to where she normally sat a small group of people were there talking.
“Excuse me, have you seen a pretty girl with long dark hair in a Sun Flower dress?”
They looked at each other and shrugged their shoulders. One of the other girls sitting there spoke up to Jeffery, “What’s her name?”
His face went white. In all of the time that he had been dreaming about her he never knew her name. He began to run down Taylor mall in embarrassment. He reached the edge of the street. Defeated, and broken he would get on the train back to his small dorm. Today college, and Wednesday lost their hopeful optimism.  Jeffery reached back to get his train card, and realized that his wallet was missing. Perfect as if today couldn’t get any worse. He started to head back to the journalist building where he thought he lost it. We walked in, and climbed up the stairs. He got to his couch, and saw no wallet. His heart sank again. He lost his wallet, lost hope of asking the most beautiful girl out on a date, and embarrassed himself doing it. He turned to walk home when he felt a tap on his shoulder. He turned to see the prettiest girl with long dark hair in a sunflower dress standing there. He felt his heart jump for joy, and he said “Hello”
“Your Jeffery Snipe right? I have your Wallet.”
He reached out and grabbed it brushing her hand he felt his heart melt some. “T-thank you, I’m Jeffery”
She smiled warmly “Jeff… I am Summer.” She paused for a moment looking at him warmly,  “can I tell you something Jeff?”
Jeff still bewildered nodded. Summer looked away then back at him “It might sound creepy but every Wednesday at 12:30 I wait for you to come out of class so I can see your smiling face, but I have never had the courage to ask you to a date.”

title: [RO] Summer

question: Summarize the overall tone of this piece of writing.

answer: The overall tone of this piece of writing was quite lighthearted and was quite whimsical at the beginning. However, overall the paper was quite unexpected because the tone of the reading was completely different to the very realistic event the piece is trying to describe. However, the tone in the end is completely changed immediately after the event the narrative is describing, Summer's confession to Jeffery Snipe.

critique: "the paper was quite unexpected" is confusing

critique: Extra information about the story that doesn't need to be stated.

critique: There is no evidence that the paper was "quite lighthearted"

critique: "at the beginning." - the event at the beginning was never mentioned

critique:
-The tone of the paper is not whimsical. The tone of the narrative is lighthearted and hopeful.
-There is no event that happens at the end of the story. Summer confesses that she has been waiting for him in class to see his smiling face.
-The tone of the paper is not unexpected.
-There are no events in the story that change the tone. The tone of the narrative remains lighthearted.

critique: The answer is not clear and does not make sense.

critique: The response is not related to the question.

critique: The response is inaccurate and does not answer the question.

critique: The passage is not trying to describe an expected event.

critique: The response is incoherent and doesn't make sense.

critique: I don't think the answer made any sense.

critique: The events in this story are not unexpected.

critique: The first sentence is inaccurate because there is nothing whimsical about the text. The ending is also inaccurate because Summer's confession had no effect on the tone of the story.

question: Summarize how the tension is resolved.

answer: Jeff responds, "I am Jeffery," and she responds likewise, saying her name is Summer. She then tells him that she is the girl he is in love with. This is news to Jeffery (and he asks her how she knows this) and he is quick to accept the fact, stating that he has been dreaming of her every week for a semester.

critique: This is not the resolution of the tension.

critique: The passage says nothing of how Jeff responds to her asking how she knows Jeff loves her.

critique: The response to Jeffery's question is not in the text.

critique: "Jeff responds, "I am Jeffery," and she responds likewise, saying her name is Summer. She then tells him that she is the girl he is in love with. This is news to Jeffery (and he asks her how she knows this) and he is quick to accept the fact, stating that he has been dreaming of her every week for a semester." - this is inaccurate. Summer says that she has been waiting for him to come out of his class so she can see his smiling face.

critique: It is not possible to state that Jeffery accepts the fact.

critique: Summer tells him she has been waiting for him to come out of class so she could see his smiling face, never having the courage to ask him out.

critique: The response is not related to the question.

critique: "Summer looked away then back at him “It might sound creepy but every Wednesday at 12:30 I wait for you to come out of class so I can see your smiling face, but I have never had the courage to ask you to a date.”" is evidence that Summer is the girl Jeffery has been dreaming about.

critique: The response is "sounding scripted and redundant".

critique: Jeffery does not say that he has been dreaming of her for a semester.

critique: Summer says that she has been waiting for him to come out of class every Wednesday.

critique: Summer says that she has been looking for Jeffery every Wednesday.

critique: The response is not relevant to the question.

question: Summarize the plot twist.

answer: Summer is the person Jeffery is waiting for and who will save him from losing his wallet and getting back on academic track. Summer has the same name and same appearance and has been viewing him secretly every week too, but for completely different reasons.

critique: The second sentence is too complicated and should be removed.

critique: Summer is not the person Jeffery is waiting for.

critique:
-The second sentence is incorrect and does not correspond to the question.
-Summer does not save Jeffery from losing his wallet.

critique: "Summer" is not the name Jeffery is waiting for.

critique: Rather than saying Summer "is the person Jeffery is waiting for" as it's implied the opposite way, I suggest you say that Jeffery ends up waiting for Summer.

critique: the answer is not relevant to the question.

critique: The last sentence is not relevant to the plot twist.

critique: The response is not related to the plot twist.

critique: The answer is very confusing and does not make sense.

critique: Summer is a girl Jeffery has been admiring from afar. She is not the girl he was waiting for.

question: Summarize why Jeff became fixated on this one girl he doesn't know as opposed to harboring a crush on other women in his life he does know.

answer: No answer

critique: Even though Jeff doesn't know Summer, she is the object of his fantasies. She is his obsession.

critique: It's not that Jeff bases his fixation on the fact that he doesn't know her, but that he has no courage to talk to her.

critique: The answer is not relevant to the question.

critique: The correct answer is that he doesn't know her name

critique: "No answer" is not an acceptable response.

critique: There isn't a good answer to this question.


text:
**Beware this is my beginning of a long story a plan to write about a hypothetical serial killer, and this passage is morbid.** Also this is a very rough draft so excuse spelling mistakes or the overuse of contractions.

 There were always rumors of a serial killer so evil, so demented, so monstrous, so gruesome, and so evil that he was looked at as more of the hypothetical monster under humanities bed than a real psychopath that needs to be hunted down and exposed. In this short story I am going to describe the infamous and horrible tale of what can be only called as “the monstrosity.”

The monstrosity was born in 1945, his exact date of birth is unknown, he was born in Midwestern America; most likely Kansas. His father was a hulk of a man who conceived him when he brutally raped his own daughter, the violence in the monster’s life began before he was even born. His mother lets call her Lesly was only seventeen years old when she gave birth to the monstrosity, who was born about three weeks premature. Lesly almost died in childbirth because the monster’s father (lets call him Larry) continued to beat her during the pregnancy which led to the premature and extremely painful birth. The doctors predicted the monstrosity would not live through the night...oh how wrong they were; looking back if the doctors knew of the evil they allowed to enter the world, they may have had no problem suffocating that small innocent child right there and then.
The monstrosity had no serious health problems from the violent birth, except for the fact that he would never grow taller than 5'5 even as a grown man; this monster’s height comes into play later and can be looked at as a curse or a blessing depending on how you read this evil’s story.

The monster’s father Larry remarried shortly after he was born, he lied to all about the real mother of the monster. Being a minor still Lesly was forced to continue to live with Larry and his new wife Marie even after all the abuse and pain he had caused her, she wouldn't run away because she felt her son deserved a real mother not a life of lies. So, for the next three-years she worked hard at her job as a waitress to save enough money to move out of the abusive home with her son and get her own place. The abuse of Lesly continued throughout these years but Larry didn’t touch his son the monster because he respected the fact that his son had a keen likeness to himself, and resented the fact that his own daughter Lesly wanted to turn his own child against him. Larry wasn't a sociopath but he was a monster by his own merit, he didn't understand why his daughter hated him and thought he was a useless excuse for a men let alone a father; even though he sexually and physically abused her after her mother passed away from cancer when Lesly was about nine-years old. Larry tried to turn the monster who was about four years old by this point against his true mother Lesly and make him love his wife Marie and him as parents.

Now, for a moment let us observe what know about Larry’s second wife Marie...she was about twenty-six years old married to Larry a much older man and little is known about her background or early-life. What we do know however straight from the words of our little monster is that she was an extremely beautiful woman; about 5’9, luscious blond hair, long legs, a nice curvy midsection, and most of all her skin according to the monster was softer than any other woman he ever met. But that all comes in to play later in this story of true evil.
I will set the scene for the beginnings of our little monster’s first look at death and real cruelty. Of course the monster was exposed to the beatings of his real mother Lesly from time to time, but Marie did her best to keep the monster away from such things. You may be thinking why would a woman as beautiful as I described Marie as be with a violent man like Larry and allow him to abuse his adult daughter? Well, since little is known about Marie’s personality (at this point in time) I guess we can just say love works in mysterious ways and in this case ends up intertwined with death and unknowingly creating pure evil. Anyway, back to the story...Lesly finally saved up enough money to take the monster away from this hateful environment and get her own nice place. But Larry and Marie didn’t like that idea, they didn’t believe that Lesly really worked for that money and accused her of prostituting herself to make the money. They called her all sorts of names, not knowing that our little monster was hiding under the bed in his mother’s room just taking all this in. Like I said he had witnessed violence before, but never had he witnessed such abuse in a verbal sense they broke his mother down. Lesly wasn't the most emotionally sound woman due to her father’s abuse and it didn't take much to break her, and by the end of the verbal abuse from Marie and Larry which went on for almost an hour she just sat in the corner wet with her own tears and ashamed that she allowed them to do that to her.

Then something happened to Lesly as she set there wallowing in her own pain and self-hate...she snapped. This young woman who received awful abuse by her own father her whole life finally snapped. She hated him with such passion, who was he to abuse her and then coddle her son like he was a decent human being when he was the one who raped her and almost killed her from beatings during her pregnancy! Lesly was not a small woman, her father Larry was about 6’6 and 250-pounds and he passed those genes onto his daughter; she was 6’3 but her weight was unknown. She grabbed Larry’s baseball bat that he used to occasionally use to beat her when he wasn't playing on the local softball team with it, and she waited in the room until she heard Marie go into her room and fall asleep. She left her room, and shortly after the monster (without her knowledge) followed her into the hallway and watched her.

She saw that Larry was passed out on the couch and she snuck up behind him, only his head was exposed from under the covers. Lesly raised the bat above her head and slammed it back down with all the might and power she had within her body. The sound of Larry’s skull cracking was sickening to the soul of a normal person...you could hear the skull break apart into small fragments and slice through the brain matter. You could taste the blood in the air and feel the lack of Larry’s existence within it. Even though our monster was only four or five years old, he describes the event with such vivid remembrance as if it was his first memory. And maybe it was, because in my opinion this moment and what happened next is what creates our little monster as he really is or will be for the rest of his so called life.

Larry was near dead after the first blow, but Lesly didn't know that and probably felt more powerful and in control than she ever had before in her entire life. She kept hitting him over and over, she destroyed his face so completely that it would take a ton of work for the cops to identify his body without just assuming. The monster describes hearing the life leave Larry’s body but instead of like it is in film he described it as just a silence within the room as if Larry’s soul or whatever made him alive had just been removed from the area. The silence as he described it was quieter than anything he would experience for a long time after.

Than the silence was broken by Lesly yelling at the monster “go to your room, you shouldn't see this baby.” Her voice wasn't the same though it sounded different than the mother the monster though he knew, it sounded emptier as if the love Lesly held for him had exited her. And even at five years old the monster says that he felt the difference.

title: The monstrosity

question: How is the "monstrosity" described in this article?

answer: The "monstrosity" is described as a serial killer.

critique: The answer would be more informative with some description of the subject.

question: What terrible scene did the monster see that impacted his whole life?

answer: This freak saw his mother hit his father on the head with a baseball bat and kill him.

critique: The answer is incomplete and should include the details of the scene.

question: Would Larry come back as ghost and control the monster to be the monster the text describes?

answer: No answer

critique: The question can't be answered because there's no information on whether or not Larry is a ghost.

critique: It is stated: "Larry wasn’t a sociopath but he was a monster by his own merit."