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A recent survey of the University of Arizona’s academic freedom policy illustrates a concern amongst survey takers regarding free speech practices.

Lynn Nadel, chair of the faculty and regents’ professor of psychology and cognitive science, said that academic freedom is not only crucial to a university but that it also protects the key function of universities.

Academic freedom involves the right to speak freely about things both in your subject matter and about institutional matters without fear of retaliation from both external and internal forces, Nadel said.

Gary Rhoades is an educational policy studies and practice professor, head of the Department of Education Policy Studies and Practice and director of the Center for the Study of Higher Education. He was also the general secretary of the American Association of University Professors, which he said has helped define academic freedom over the past 100 years.

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“It provides a freedom that’s really important in a democracy for academics to be able to engage in open exchange in four different areas of activity in academics,” Rhoades said.

The foundation of academic freedom is the freedom to teach, research, comment on public matters and speak about internal institutional matters.

“There should be no retaliation or someone trying to influence or shape what is being said or taught,” Rhoades said. “As long as one clearly remains that their view is independent of the university’s, they can speak about public matters without fear or retribution.”

Nadel said that even with a good written policy in place, we need to revisit the policy to address rising issues.

“There were a lot more people that felt the written protections were good, rather than safe,” Nadel said.

According to the survey of 778 respondents, “More than 50 percent believe that academic freedom at the UA is insufficiently protected.”

Nadel and Rhoades both agreed that the main issues regarding the current UA policy is the lack of clarity regarding who is protected and what to do in the case of an academic freedom complaint.

Among those who took the survey, 49 percent identified as faculty on tenure or tenure track. The survey showed that those who are not on tenure track feel especially vulnerable and distrustful of the current policy.

Rhoades said these people feel at risk and that there are questions of formal protection built into the UA’s policies. He said he believes it’s a fair assessment that the policy is unclear, indicating that it’s problematic they don’t believe their freedom will be protected.

“When I say I’m not afraid to speak up, that’s easy for me to say,” Nadel said. “I’m a [tenured] full professor. What are they going to do to me? But my assistant professor colleague may not be willing to be as outspoken. My [untenured] graduate student may be afraid to say anything at all.”

Zach Brooks, president of the Graduate and Professional Student Council, said that graduate students occupy a strange “middle ground.”

“We have an interesting role, because sometimes we as graduate students are teachers, researchers, clinicians and administrators, but we’re also students,” Brooks said.

He added that, at times, graduate students may feel less able to speak up, and other times, they might have more ability to speak because they’re not full-time employees of the university and have less fear over what they say.

“What we think we’re going to do is make the existing protections a lot better known and make it absolutely clear what things are in place to protect each category of employee,” Nadel said.

Rhoades added that one way to do this is to “meet with smaller targeted groups of employees about these issues” and develop ideas for protective policies that are more inclusive.

Nadel said if you don’t speak up, then you can never determine if you’re protected.

“In order for an individual or, more importantly, for an institution to create a culture where academic freedom is believed in and valued, where people feel confident that it’s going to be enforced, we have to be talking about it and exercising it,” Rhoades said.

There are major issues regarding what the process is when academic freedom is violated.

Both Rhoades and Nadel said the current chart indicating what to do is confusing and complicated. Rhoades said that everyone involved must “work toward better clarification” on what must be done in situations where violations of any one’s academic freedom may have occurred.

“We want to make the processes under the policy much better understood,” Nadel said. “We need to be much more specific and get the information out there, so that people will be more aware of everything that’s in place to protect them.”

Rhoades added that another thing that could be done is for formal leaders of the university to make important affirmations to the university community that academic freedom is valued.

“Universities are among the most important places where we’re creating and disseminating knowledge,” he said. “We have people who are studying a whole variety of issues and topics, and if we allow that institution to be unfairly restricted or confined with what it can talk about and what it can explore, then we’re hampering our ability as a democracy to discuss difficult issues and … engage in all sorts of exploration that makes us interesting important, curious and innovative people.”

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question: What does the text say about the University of Arizona football team?

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critique: The answer should be "no answer" because the text does not mention anything about the football team.

critique: The answer should mention that the text doesn't mention the football team.

critique: The response misses to mention that there is no information given about the University of Arizona football team.

critique: The answer should mention that the text does not mention the football team.

question: What does the text say about academic freedom in universities?

answer: Academic freedom is the right to speak freely about things both in your subject matter and about institutional matters without fear of retaliation from both external and internal forces. Academic freedom is crucial to a university and protects the key function of universities. Academic freedom involves the right to teach, research, comment on public matters, and speak about internal institutional matters.

critique: The answer could be more specific about what academic freedom means and what it entails.

critique: Academic freedom also includes commenting or participating in public matters.

critique: The answer could be clearer in its wording.

question: What does the text say about the survey regarding the University of Arizona's free speech practices?

answer: A survey of the University of Arizona's academic freedom policy illustrates a concern amongst survey takers regarding free speech practices. The survey showed that more than 50 percent believe that academic freedom at the UA is insufficiently protected. The survey also showed that those who are not on the tenure track feel especially vulnerable and distrustful of the current policy.

critique: The survey also showed that 49 percent of the respondents identified as faculty on the tenure or tenure track.

question: What does the text say about where graduate students stand in UA's academic freedom policy?

answer: Graduate students occupy a strange "middle ground" because they are both students and teachers, researchers, clinicians, and administrators. They may feel less able to speak up, and other times, they might have more ability to speak because they're not full-time employees of the university and have less fear over what they say.

critique: The answer should mention that Zach Brooks, president of the Graduate and Professional Student Council, says that graduate students occupy a strange "middle ground".


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_GELD ODER LEBEN!_ (“Your Money or Your Life!”) is an album by the Austrian band Erste Allgemeine Verunsicherung.

Released in Germany in 1985 on catalogue number EMI Columbia 1333631 on the vinyl format and then reissued in 1986 EMI Columbia 1333631, also on vinyl but with a different cover.

In 1986, the album was also reissued on CD in Germany, on catalogue number EMI Columbia 7462302.

This album was released three times on cassette tape in The Netherlands, two of them in 1985, one on catalogue number EMI Columbia 1333634 and the other on catalogue number EMI Columbia 33394-8. In 1987, _Geld oder Leben!_ was certified three times platinum in Austria.[1]

The third issue was in 1991 on catalogue number EMI Columbia 1333634, with a different cover. In 1991, the album was also reissued on CD in The Netherlands, on catalogue number EMI Austria 7462302.

The tracks which feature “Johnny” at the start of the title are short humorous skits, in which the punchline usually changes the perspective of the previous part from a stereotypical Mafia-style criminal situation into something much more common and everydayish due to words with multiple meanings - e.g. in “Feuer”, Johnny asks his boss whether he has fire (for a cigarette), and his boss responds with opening gunfire, and in “Bullen”, Johnny warns his boss about “the bulls are coming” (German slang, similar to “the cops are coming”), to which the boss responds “let them in”, followed by the noise of a bull stampede.

Track listing

Ba-Ba-Bankrobbery

The band attempted to become better known on the international market by releasing their first – and only – English language single “Ba-Ba-Bankrobbery” in 1986 (apart from a translation of the song Ding Dong). This English-language version of “Ba-Ba-Banküberfall”, which was originally released in 1985 on a single but only in Germany appears on the “Geld oder Leben” album. “Ba-Ba-Bankrobbery” was released as a single in the UK, Germany, Spain and Canada on both 7" and 12" formats. The single was also released in Japan on 7" only.

The 12" version (or maxi) appears on the “Kann denn Schwachsinn Sünde sein?” (Can imbecility be a sin?) album, although the 7" English version does not seem to appear on any albums.

The song was basically a rap about how a man with no money can survive and comes up with the idea of robbing a bank as he can't think of any other way. This track was not very melodic, which did not seem to do it any favours. The “English-German” version is just the English version in a German accent. It is not a bilingual version as the title may suggest. The “British-British” version is the same but with a British accent, this appeared as an extended form on the 12" releases along with the standard length “English-German” version and the German-language version itself. As if this was not confusing enough, the 7" labelled the A side as “Ba-Ba-Bankrobbery (English Version??)”.

The Guinness Hit Singles book printed this title exactly how it printed on the label which made it look as though the authors were not sure of what they were printing. This was in the 7th edition, however more recent copies appeared to have dropped the question marks.

The song did not do very well. For instance in the UK, it was in the top 75 for just 4 weeks, peaking at number 68. The standard UK 7" featured the German accent version on the A side and the German-language version on the B side. It may have seemed a better idea to have recorded a few more English language tracks and released them as well in order to gain more international favour like the German band Dschinghis Khan did. The band did not record any further English-language versions of their songs, but used English in some of their regular songs.

Despite the band's failed attempt to gain international fame, they still remain quite popular in Germany and Austria.

Personnel

Erste Allgemeine Verunsicherung

-   Klaus Eberhartinger: lead vocals
-   Thomas Spitzer: guitars, vocals, lead vocals on “Helden”
-   Nino Holm: keyboards, bass, backing vocals
-   Eik Breit: bass, backing vocals
-   Anders Stenmo: drums
-   Mario Bottazzi: backing vocals
-   Günther Schönberger: backing vocals

Additional personnel

-   Marion Müller: backing vocals

Certifications

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title: Geld oder Leben!

question: What does the text say about Geld order Leben?

answer: Geld oder Leben is an album by the Austrian band Erste Allgemeine Verunsicherung. The album was released in Germany in 1985 on catalogue number EMI Columbia 1333631 on the vinyl format and then reissued in 1986 on the same format with a different cover. The album was reissued on CD in Germany in 1986 on EMI Columbia 7462302. The album was released three times on cassette tape in The Netherlands, two of them in 1985, on EMI Columbia 1333634 and the other on EMI Columbia 33394-8. In 1987, Geld oder Leben! was certified three times platinum in Austria. The third issue was in 1991 on EMI Columbia 1333634, with a different cover. In 1991, the album was also reissued on CD in The Netherlands, on EMI Austria 7462302.

critique: The answer is a summary of the entire text.

critique: This is less a summary of the album's releases and more a summary of the text.

critique: The answer is a summary of the text, not a summary of what the text says about Geld oder Leben.

critique: The text also mentions that the album was released as an English language single.

critique: The album was released in 1985 and 1986, not 1985 and 1985.

text: The answer could add that the tracks which feature “Johnny” at the start of the title are short humorous skits.

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question: What does the text say about music production?

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critique: The answer should mention that the text does not discuss music production.

critique: The answer should mention the band's attempts to become better known on the international market.

question: What does the text say about the personnel involved in the production process?

answer: Erste Allgemeine Verunsicherung has a six-person personnel: Klaus Eberhartinger (lead vocals), Thomas Spitzer (guitars, vocals), Nino Holm (keyboards, bass, backing vocals), Eik Breit (bass, backing vocals), Anders Stenmo (drums) and Mario Bottazzi (backing vocals). Mario Bottazzi is the only additional person involved in the production process.

critique: The answer should mention the group's name.

critique: The answer omits the band's backing vocals.

critique: 'Erste Allgemeine Verunsicherung has a six-person personnel' is inaccurate. It was never mentioned anywhere in the passage that their personnel involves six people.

critique: The answer omits that Günther Schönberger is also involved as a backing vocals.

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-The answer omits Marion Müller as an additional backing vocal for the band. It should state this.
-'Erste Allgemeine Verunsicherung has six-person personnel:' This is inaccurate because according to the text, it has 8.

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category_text: Coverage and accuracy.

question: What does the text say about the German music industry?

answer: No answer


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THE BRUNSWICK FOUR were four lesbians involved in an historic incident in Toronto, Ontario in 1974. The four were evicted from the Brunswick House, a working-class beer hall on Bloor Street, and subsequently arrested, and three were later tried in Ontario Court for obstruction of justice.[1] Two of those three women were acquitted in May 1974, but one, Adrienne Potts, served three months probation.[2]

Importance of the incident

Gay historian Tom Warner believes that the arrest and its consequences was a key incident ushering in a more militant gay and lesbian liberation movement in Canada, much as the Stonewall Inn riot politicized gays and lesbians in the United States. Warner also notes that this was one of the first occasions that a gay or lesbian topic received extensive press coverage in Canada.[3]

In the tavern

On January 5, 1974, Adrienne Potts (now Adrienne Rosen), Pat Murphy, Sue Wells and Heather (Beyer) Elizabeth performed a song at amateur night at the Brunswick Tavern. Their chosen song, “I Enjoy Being A Dyke” (a parody of “I Enjoy Being a Girl”, a song by Rodgers and Hammerstein from the musical play _Flower Drum Song_) drew the attention of the bar's owner.[4] Their version of the song challenged the unwanted male attention they were receiving at the bar that night, exemplified in this verse: “When I see a man who’s sexist and does something that I don’t like, I just tell him that he can Fuck Off, I enjoy being a Dyke!”[5]

The four were asked by the owner to leave the premises. They refused to leave, and were arrested by 8 uniformed police officers. The lesbians alleged verbal and physical police harassment as a result of the incident.[6][7][8][9][10][11]

Arrest and trial

Although they were not charged with a crime, to protest their arrest they refused to leave the police station. The police forcibly ejected the Four from the police station, punching Potts in the back of the head and throwing her to the ground. [12] According to historian Kelly Phipps, "They returned to the Brunswick House hoping to find witnesses, but were met by two uniformed police officers, two bouncers, and two plainclothes detectives. Again, they were tossed in an unmarked car and taken back to the station. During the five hours of processing their paperwork, police officers amused themselves with remarks such as, “I bet you drive a tug boat” and “Did you ever put your finger in a Dyke?”[13] The arrest and subsequent trial received coverage in _The Globe and Mail_, the _Toronto Star_, and a number of smaller community papers and magazines.[14] The three women, Pat Murphy, Adrienne Potts (now Rosen) and Heather Elizabeth were represented by lawyer Judy LaMarsh, who was a former Liberal cabinet minister.[15] LaMarsh represented them _pro bono_ because she was outraged by the treatment they endured at the hands of the police.

Community response

Warner describes the “anger and concern” of the Toronto gay community, and notes that a public meeting was called at which the “Brunswick Four minus One Defense Fund” (named so because only three people were arrested; Susan Wells was not) was launched.[16]

Three of the Brunswick Four were charged, and two of the women were acquitted in May 1974. One of the four; Adrienne Potts, served three months probation.[17]

Toronto Police Officers Charged with Assault

After the trial, Potts, Murphy and Elizabeth charged the arresting officers with assault. The charges were laid by the Crown after the three women produced evidence in the form of doctor's notes and photographs of extensive bruising. Unbeknownst to the women, the police officers had exchanged their hats and the badge numbers that established their identities were confused. At trial, because of this trick, the women couldn't accurately identify the officers. Murphy, Potts and Elizabeth refused to participate in the trial, calling it a scam and miscarriage of justice. When the court clerk ordered everyone to rise for a recess the women refused to rise. The clerk ordered the court to rise a second time. They refused. They were then charged with criminal contempt of court and led to the cells at Old City Hall. Potts and Elizabeth returned to court hours later to apologize but Murphy refused earning 30 days in jail. The officers were acquitted. Later, The Royal Commission on Toronto Police Practices ordered the three to appear and Murphy and Elizabeth gave testimony. Potts (now Rosen) moved to Vancouver and refused to participate. Pat Murphy died in 2003. Heather Elizabeth (Lamar Van Dyke) lives in Seattle and Adrienne Potts (Rosen) lives with her family in Toronto.

[1] Warner, Tom. _Never Going Back: A History of Queer Activism in Canada_, 2002, University of Toronto Press, .

[2] _Brunswick Tavern Dykes_, _Long Time Coming_, May/June 1974

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[5] Gay Almanac, “Today in 1974: The Brunswick Four Arrested in Toronto,” last modified January 5, 2018, http://www.thegayalmanac.com/2018/01/today-in-1974-brunswick-four-arrested.html.>

[6] Fania Schwabel, “Our shocking past: Queer youth offer four quickie histories” , _Xtra!_, September 23, 1999.

[7] “Three claim that police abused them in garage”, _Toronto Star_, May 28, 1975.

[8] “Woman Guilty, Two cleared in disturbance”, _The Globe and Mail_, June 1, 1974.

[9] Rachel Giese, “Friends & Allies: Two generations make history together” . _Xtra!_, August 26, 1999.

[10] “Brunswick Tavern Dykes”, _Long Time Coming_, May/June 1974, p6,

[11] “The Other Woman”, April 1974, p17, “Uppity Women”, _Body Politic (magazine)_, March/April 1974, p1

[12] “Uppity Women,” The Body Politic, no. 12 (March/April 1974): 1

[13] Kelly Phipps, “Look over here, look over there, lesbians are everywhere”: Locating Activist Lesbians in Queer Liberation History, PhD Thesis, Concordia University, 2019, pg.98.

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[15] “Lawyer former cabinet member”. _The Advocate_, March 13, 1974.

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title: Brunswick Four

question: How were the four women arrested?

answer: They were asked to leave the premises of the bar, but they refused.

question: Why were the four women arrested?

answer: They were arrested for performing a song that was a parody of a Rodgers and Hammerstein song.

critique: The answer should mention the police's reaction to the song.

critique: The answer could be more specific about what the song is.

critique: The answer should mention the name of the song.

critique: The answer should mention that the song was a challenge to the unwanted male attention the women were receiving.

question: What happened when the police officers were charged?

answer: The police officers were acquitted.

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text: The answer should mention how the police officers avoided identification.

question: Who represented the women?

answer: Judy LaMarsh who was a former Liberal cabinet minister.

critique: The women were represented by Judy LaMarsh, which is a separate subject to choosing who represented a person.

text: The answer would be better rounded up if it mention why LaMarsh represented the women pro-bono.


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__NOTOC__ ADRIENNE ELIZABETH MCNEIL HERNDON was an actress, professor, and activist in Atlanta, Georgia. While admittedly an African American to friends and colleagues, she performed with the stage name Anne Du Bignon. She was one of the first African American faculty at Atlanta University, where she met W. E. B. Du Bois and subsequently worked with him. Herndon and Alonzo Herndon were an influential couple.[1]

Biography

Adrienne Elizabeth McNeil was born on July 22, 1869, in Savannah, Georgia.[2] She is described by historian Rebecca Burns as “short and lithe with a lively manner and sophisticated bearing” “[w]ith her creamy skin, wavy brown hair, and dark eyes, Adrienne moved easily [...] and kept her racial background a secret”.[3] She was about five feet tall.[4]

McNeil was an 1890 graduate of Atlanta University's Normal Department, and attended the Boston School of Dramatic Arts (1902-3)[5] and New York City's American Academy of Dramatic Arts.[6] For her final project she performed _Anthony and Cleopatra_ under the stage name Anne Du Bignon, claiming she was French-Creole.[7][8]

At Atlanta University Herndon became “the first director of dramatics and teacher of elocution” from 1895, until her death in 1910.[9] She was one of the first two African American faculty at Atlanta University (the other was George Towns), two years prior to Du Bois.[10] There she organised fundraising and an annual Shakespeare play for the senior class.[11][12]

In January 1904, Herndon made her debut with a solo-performed at Steinert Hall in Boston again using the name Anne Du Bignon.[13] She also sang at recitals.[14]

[Herndon c. 1910]

Herndon supported black suffrage. Du Bois and Adrienne Herndon were colleagues at Atlanta university.[15] In October 1904, Alonzo signed the Ontario Conference led by Du Bois.[16] Adrienne Herndon, in 1905, hosted the “Niagara Movement” organized by Du Bois.[17] She participated in Du Bois's Wheat Street Baptist Church demonstration on November 30, 1905, for the “southern movement” by joining him on the platform.[18] During the Atlanta Riots two of Alonzo's employees were attacked and killed.[19] The Tuesday morning after the rioting, Herndon [20] along with Reverend Henry H. Proctor met with the city mayor and chief of police to discuss safety for victims and justice for the rioters.[21]

Adrienne McNeil married Alonzo Herndon[22] in 1894.[23] Before she agreed to marry him, he had to promise to support her theater career.[24] In 1897 Adrienne and Alonzo Herndon had a son, Norris Bumstead Herndon.[25]

[Herndon Home, designed by Adrienne, in Atlanta, Georgia] The Herndon Home, she designed without plans but worked closely with a team of black craftsmen.[26] Unfortunately Adrienne died of Addison's disease just when the home that she had designed to be their “first real home” was nearing completion, on April 6, 1910.[27][28][29]

Norris Herndon, a 1919 graduate of Atlanta University, developed his father's insurance company from $1 million to $54 million in assets.[30][31] In 1947 Norris Herndon established the Herndon Foundation which maintains the Herndon Home.[32] He transformed the house into a museum in 1973.[33] It was declared a U.S. National Historic Landmark in 2000.[34]

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Further reading

-   -   Clarence Albert Bacote, _The story of Atlanta University: a century of service, 1865-1965_, Atlanta University, 1969.
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answer: Herndon was described by historian Rebecca Burns as "short and lithe with a lively manner and sophisticated bearing." She had creamy skin, wavy brown hair, and dark eyes. She was about five feet tall.

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text: The answer could mention that she was African American but kept her racial background a secret.

question: Summarize everything relating to Herndon and Du Bois.

answer: Herndon was one of the first African American faculty at Atlanta University. She met W.E.B. Du Bois there and subsequently worked with him. They were colleagues. Herndon supported black suffrage. She hosted the Niagara Movement organized by Du Bois. She participated in Du Bois's Wheat Street Baptist Church demonstration.

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critique: It is omitted that Herndon and Alonzo Herndon were an influential couple.

question: What does the text say about education?

answer: Adrienne Elizabeth McNeil was born in Savannah, Georgia, and was a graduate of Atlanta University's Normal Department. She attended the Boston School of Dramatic Arts and the New York City's American Academy of Dramatic Arts. She was the first director of dramatics and teacher of elocution at Atlanta University. Her son Norris was a 1919 graduate of Atlanta University.

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HOLY TRINITY CHURCH (formerly ST MICHAEL'S CHURCH), is in the village of Bolton-le-Sands, Lancashire, England. It is an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. Its benefice is united with that of St Mark, Nether Kellett.[1] The church is recorded in the National Heritage List for England as a designated Grade II* listed building.[2]

History

A church has been on the site since before 1094.[3] The oldest parts of the present church are the tower and the north arcade, which date from the late 15th century. The nave was built in 1813.[4] In 1847 the Lancaster architectural practice of Sharpe and Paley rebuilt the chancel,[5][6] and in 1851 added a pulpit and a reading desk.[7] The church was restored in 1863–64 by E. G. Paley (by this time Sharpe had retired from the practice).[8] In 1881 the practice, now Paley and Austin, carried out further alterations, which included widening the north aisle, adding a vestry, a porch, a pulpit, and a font, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, opening the tower arch, replacing windows, reseating the church to accommodate 450 people, and retiling and refitting the chancel.[9]

Architecture

Exterior

The church is constructed in rubble with slate roofs. The tower is in ashlar sandstone, and the south wall of the nave is pebbledashed. Its plan consists of a nave, a north aisle, a south porch, a chancel and a west tower. The tower is in three stages. In the bottom stage is a west door and a three-light window.[10] This window is flanked by niches with pinnacles.[11] The bell openings also have three lights. The tower is supported by diagonal buttresses, and on its summit is a battlemented parapet.[12] At its southwest is a projection for stairs.[13] The windows in the south nave wall contain Perpendicular tracery.[14] The chancel is in Early English style.[15]

Interior

The arcade is in five bays running between the nave and chancel, and the north aisle.[16] It is supported by octagonal piers, other than the second pier from the east, which is rectangular.[17] The nave has a hammerbeam roof, and the chancel roof is scissor-braced.[18] Between the chancel and the aisle is a sandstone memorial to the memory of a man who died in 1642 with the inscription “It is supposed that he lived above 100 yeares”.[19][20] Elsewhere there are 19th-century monuments in Classical style, and brasses dated 1692 and 1872. The reredos is in alabaster and dates from 1897. The stained glass in the west window dates from 1891. It depicts archangels, was designed by Carl Almquist, and made by Shrigley and Hunt.[21] The glass in the chancel windows was designed by William Wailes.[22] Also in the church are two pieces of carved Anglo-Saxon stone dating from the 10th century.[23]

External features

In the churchyard to the south of the church is a square sandstone cross base with two steps. Its age is not known. It is surmounted by a later square block and a 20th-century cross.[24] The churchyard also contains the war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.[25]

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title: Holy Trinity Church, Bolton-le-Sands

question: Summarize what happened to the church during the 1800s.

answer: During the 1800s, a practice of Sharpe and Paley rebuilt the chancel, later in 1851 they added a pulpit and a reading desk. The church was restored by E.G. Paley, who also replaced windows. In 1881 the practice, now Paley and Austin carried out alterations, adding a vestry and porch, lowering the floor, removing the gallery, opening the tower arch, replacing windows, reseating the church to accommodate 450 people, and refitting and retiling the chancel. The reredos dates of 1897, and the stained glass in the west window dates to 1891.

critique: The answer should mention the addition of the nave.

critique: The answer fails to properly organize its response and should re-order or delete some sentences so that the passage reads chronologically -- EGPPaly built the chancel in 1847, replacing windows and resetting the cathedral in 1863, etc.

critique: The answer should mention the additions made to the church during the 1800s.

critique: The answer should mention the addition of the bell tower in the 19th century.

question: What does the text say about the churchyard?

answer: The churchyard has a square sandstone cross base with two steps that's older than the church. It's surmounted by a later square block and a 20th-century cross. There are also war graves of two British and one Canadian soldier of World War I.

critique: The answer should mention that the churchyard is to the south of the church.

question: What does the text say about the church's use today?

answer: The church is an active Anglican parish church in the deanery of Tunstall, the archdeaconry of Lancaster, and the diocese of Blackburn. Its benefice is united with that of St Mark, Nether Kellett.

question: What does the text say about the buildings near the church?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention the cross base.

critique: There's no answer, but there is undoubtedly a lot to say about the area.

critique: The answer should mention the cross in the churchyard.

critique: The answer should mention the cross base in the churchyard.

critique: It is omitted that the church is in the village of Bolton-le-Sands, Lancashire, England.


text:
A Great Investment For a First Time Home Buyer in NH

If you’re a first time home buyer in NH, and haven’t yet considered the benefits of a condominium, take a second to think about it one more time. Condos are ideal for many reasons and have become an increasingly popular alternative to using that first time home buyers loan to purchase a large home. In NH, and the Seacoast in particular, condo sales have steadily increased over the past year or so. The month of July was the best month for condominium sales volume in the Seacoast region since last July, according to a recent report from the Seacoast Board of Realtors. Condo units also reached an annual high for the year that exceeded 2013 totals by 23 percent, according to SBR. Here are 7 reasons a first time home buyer in NH should consider buying a condo:

LOCATION, LOCATION, LOCATION

Condos tend to be clustered closer to our urban centers, so a first time home buyer in NH looking to stay close to the action in Portsmouth, Manchester, Concord or elsewhere can enjoy the advantages of an in-town apartment but keep the benefits of being a home owner.

AMENITIES

Condos can provide a family access to amenities that they are less likely to afford for a home using their first time home buyers loans. Around NH, many condo associations offer access to pools, gyms, sports facilities, clubhouses and more.

MAINTENANCE

Daunted by the idea of managing the upkeep on a home? Condo associations deal with a good portion of the day-to-day maintenance on your property. Families in condos can forgo the costs of mowers, snow blowers, and exterior cleaning, and have more time to focus on the interior of their new home.

PRICING

In New Hampshire and Massachusetts, the average condo price is 25% lower than the average home price, but appreciate as reliably as a home, so families just starting out can have all the benefits of ownership with lower monthly payments on their first time home buyers loans. In fact, monthly payments on condo owners’ first time home loans can often come in cheaper than renting a comparable property as mortgage payments remain steady while rents continually rise.

SAFETY

Condo associations usually provide an additional layer of security over homes with an additional locked entrance, or sometimes even a gate or doorman. Living in closer proximity to others within the condo community helps keep possessions and people safe.

NEWFOUND STABILITY

Condos were hit slightly harder than houses during the economic downturn, and have recovered at a slower rate as many condos were not owner occupied, were considered investments, or acted as second homes. Since then, however, measures have been put in place by the FHA and others to ensure more stability in the condo market, making them more reliable investments than they used to be. In fact, it is now thought that condos in smaller buildings are less susceptible than homes to booms and busts.

A GOOD START

For a family just starting out, a condo can be a good intermediate purchase between renting and a home. First time home buyers in NH can begin to build equity while maintaining less of a financial burden than renting an apartment of a similar size.

At Blue Water Mortgage, we pride ourselves on finding first time home buyers loans that fit their needs and budget. If you are considering a condo purchase, our loan professionals are here to educate and help you through every step of the process. Contact us today for more information.

[Roger Odoardi]

Roger is an owner and licensed Loan Officer at the Blue Water Mortgage office in Hampton, NH. Roger graduated from the University of New Hampshire Whittemore School of Business and has been in the mortgage industry for over 15 years. Roger has originated over 1500 residential loans and is licensed in New Hampshire, Massachusetts, Maine, Connecticut and Florida.

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question: What does the text say about buying a mansion?

answer: No answer

critique: The text does not mention anything about buying a mansion.

critique: The article does not mention anything about buying a mansion.

critique: The text doesn't mention anything about buying a mansion.

critique: The answer should mention that the article doesn't talk about buying mansions.

question: What does the text say about condo sales in New Hampshire and the Seacoast?

answer: Condo sales have steadily increased over the past year or so in New Hampshire and the Seacoast. In July, 2013, the month of July was the best month for condominium sales volume in the Seacoast region since last July, according to a recent report from the Seacoast Board of Realtors. Condo units also reached an annual high for the year that exceeded 2013 totals by 23 percent, according to SBR.

critique: The answer would be more accurate if it replaced "2013" with "July"

critique: The answer should mention that the article is about condo sales in New Hampshire and the Seacoast.

critique: The answer should mention that the condo sales have increased.

critique: The answer should mention that the month of July was the best month for condominium sales volume in the Seacoast region since last July.

critique: The answer should mention that the increase in condo sales is due to the benefits of condos.

critique: The answer should mention that condo sales are increasing.

critique: Condo unit sales do not exceed 2013 totals by 23%, but in July they exceeded the totals by 23%.

critique: The answer should mention that condo sales have increased.

question: What does the text say about the benefits of buying a condominium for first-time homebuyers in NH?

answer: Condos are ideal for many reasons and have become an increasingly popular alternative to using that first time home buyers loan to purchase a large home. Condos are clustered closer to urban centers, so a first-time homebuyer in NH looking to stay close to the action in Portsmouth, Manchester, Concord, or elsewhere can enjoy the advantages of an in-town apartment but keep the benefits of being a homeowner. Condos can provide a family access to amenities that they are less likely to afford for a home using their first time home buyers loans. Condo associations deal with a good portion of the day-to-day maintenance on your property. Families in condos can forgo the costs of mowers, snow blowers, and exterior cleaning, and have more time to focus on the interior of their new home. In New Hampshire and Massachusetts, the average condo price is 25% lower than the average home price, but appreciate as reliably as a home, so families just starting out can have all the benefits of ownership with lower monthly payments on their first time home buyers loans. In fact, monthly payments on condo owners’ first time home loans can often come in cheaper than renting a comparable property as mortgage payments remain steady while rents continually rise. Condo associations usually provide an additional layer of security over homes with an additional locked entrance, or sometimes even a gate or doorman. Living in closer proximity to others within the condo community helps keep possessions and people safe. Condos were hit slightly harder than houses during the economic downturn, and have recovered at a slower rate as many condos were not owner occupied, were considered investments, or acted as second homes. Since then, however, measures have been put in place by the FHA and others to ensure more stability in the condo market, making them more reliable investments than they used to be. In fact, it is now thought that condos in smaller buildings are less susceptible than homes to booms and busts. For a family just starting out, a condo can be a good intermediate purchase between renting and a home. First time home buyers in NH can begin to build equity while maintaining less of a financial burden than renting an apartment of a similar size.

critique: Remove the last sentence for space concerns, as the argument is made in the earlier parts of the answer.

critique: This is a reiteration of the main point of the article, not a specific benefit.

critique: The answer is a summary of the text and not a direct response to the question.

question: What does the text say about the main benefits to choosing a condo over a house?

answer: Condos tend to be clustered closer to urban centers, so a first-time home buyer in NH looking to stay close to the action in Portsmouth, Manchester, Concord, or elsewhere can enjoy the advantages of an in-town apartment but keep the benefits of being a homeowner. Condo associations offer access to amenities that a family is less likely to afford for a home. Condo associations deal with a good portion of the day-to-day maintenance on your property. Families in condos can forgo the costs of mowers, snow blowers, and exterior cleaning, and have more time to focus on the interior of their new home. Condos were hit slightly harder than houses during the economic downturn, and have recovered at a slower rate as many condos were not owner occupied, were considered investments, or acted as second homes. Since then, however, measures have been put in place by the FHA and others to ensure more stability in the condo market, making them more reliable investments than they used to be. In fact, it is now thought that condos in smaller buildings are less susceptible than homes to booms and busts.

critique: The answer doesn't mention the lower price of condos.

critique: The answer is a summary of the text, not a list of benefits.

critique: The response includes extraneous information that is not useful for the task.

critique: The answer is a summary of the article, not a list of the benefits of condos.

critique: There's no evidence in the text that condominiums are safer than houses providing an additional layer of security.


text:
TOYOTA 86 FACELIFT
PREVIEW DRIVE
OYAMA, JAPAN

_TOYOTA’S UPDATED 86 WAS LAUNCHED IN JAPAN THIS WEEK WITH REVISED LOOKS AND A LITTLE EXTRA OOMPH; WELL, AT LEAST FOR MANUAL VARIANTS. THERE’S ALSO MORE EQUIPMENT AND A MILD UPDATE TO THE MODEL’S INTERIOR — CHANGES AIMED AT KEEPING THE POPULAR AND AFFORDABLE COMPACT COUPE FRESH. DUE TO GO ON SALE LOCALLY IN NOVEMBER THIS YEAR, IT IS HOPED THE REVISED 86 WILL STAY CLOSE TO ITS CURRENT SUB $30K KICK-OFF PRICE._

The 86 was something of a revelation when it launched in Australia in mid-2012. It returned Toyota to the budget sports car segment with a stellar blend of involving dynamics, athletic good looks and, importantly, a price that made it attainable.

Since then the 86 has maintained its popularity with monthly sales figures that defy sports car trends — even those of Toyota’s former affordable sports car challenger, the Celica.

Now, the 86 has been revised with sharper looks, more equipment and a little extra oomph, at least for manual variants. There’s worthwhile changes to the suspension and interior, too, and though we’re unsure of any price movement at this stage, expect little change in the enormous value equation already on offer. The 86 currently retails from $29,990 (plus on-road costs).

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Visually the facelifted 86 is recognised by a lower, sharper front bumper cover said to improve downforce and reduce aerodynamic turbulence over the wheel-wells. The vents and piston badge of the front quarter panel are now omitted, replaced by a smaller, round 86 logo behind the front wheel. All models receive LED tail-lights.

Additionally, high-grade GTS models receive an all-aluminium bootlid spoiler (to replace the plastic unit used previously) and new-look 17-inch alloy wheels, while also adopting LED headlights, DRLs (daytime running lights) and foglights.

There are changes inside, too, including the use of soft-touch Grandluxe material (similar to Alcantara) atop the instrument binnacle and door cards.

[]The instrument panel itself is faced with a new tachometer (the 7000rpm redline now set at the 12 o’clock position), while the GTS adds a new 4.2-inch MID (multi-information display) with lap-time and G meter.

All models receive Toyota’s smallest-ever steering wheel (-3mm to 362) with steering wheel controls added on GTS variants, and all-new upholstery – GT variants score new black cloth and GTS variants perforated a black Grandluxe and leather combination. The infotainment system is unchanged.

Perhaps more important are changes to the 86’s suspension. Taking lessons it learnt from Toyota’s 24 Hours of Nurburgring 86, the factory has bolstered spot welding and sheetmetal thickness in the rear-end, stiffening the frame.

The changes are balanced with softer rear springs and dampers (-15 per cent) and a slimmer anti-roll bar (-1mm to 14mm). Up front are firmer coils and dampers (+10 per cent), and an EPAS (electric power-assist steering) re-tune. And let’s not forget the inclusion of a ‘half-way’ mode for the stability control system dubbed ‘Track Mode’.

Under the bonnet we find zero changes to automatic variants – the alterations made to manual models resulting in excessive drive-by noise levels on the rev-blipping auto.

For six-speed manual variants the changes extend to a spider-style, cast aluminium intake manifold, new air intake plumbing, buffed intake and exhaust valve stems and a smoother camshaft journal.

[]Toyota has also remapped the torque curve of the modified manual to bolster response at lower engine speeds. The 212Nm of torque now available arrives 200rpm earlier than before (now 6400-6600rpm) while the 152kW now on offer arrives at an unchanged 7000rpm. Automatic variants still offer 147kW (at 7000rpm) and 205Nm (over 6400-6600rpm).

Fuel consumption figures have yet to be announced, though the 86’s chief engineer, Tetsuya Tada, indicated a slight reduction for the updated mill. Similarly, 0-100km/h times are also under wraps, though we expected little change from the current model’s 7.6sec (8.2sec for the auto).

We sampled the revised 86 back-to-back with the current model at Fuji Speedways short circuit, and found incremental differences that refine the overall experience. Power changes are appreciably small, but benefit delivery and throttle response when accelerating from corners – as does the changed final drive ratio (now 4.30:1, up from 4.10:1) — helping the 86’s boxer four to rev more freely.

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Changes to the suspension are likewise cumulative in effect, refining — rather than rewriting — the feel at the wheel. The softer rear-end improves turn-in while at the same time reducing the ‘stepped’ progression of the previous model.

The linearity in the way the rear-end loads is appreciably different, improving predictability and aiding placement in corners. We dare say it will also result in a more comfortable ride.

The steering is more consistent in its weighting, the revised mapping of the EPAS system tending to flatten-out the peaks and troughs the current model exhibits during heavy cornering. There’s a little more assistance at all speeds, though we wouldn’t say this comes at the cost of road feel.

[]Overall, the changes improve the 86’s liveability, as well as the way it communicates with the driver. The chassis is easier to understand, making it easier to pilot at speed and less daunting during sudden direction changes.

It’s more difficult to break cornering traction, but far easier to control once sideways, increasing its dynamic threshold and making it faster on a twisting road, while also making it easier to drift beyond the limit on a racetrack.

After our first taste at Fuji, we can’t wait to sample the upgraded 86 on our favourite roads and tracks after it arrives Down Under in November.

2017 TOYOTA 86 MANUAL PRICING AND SPECIFICATIONS:
PRICE: TBC (currently from $29,990)
ENGINE: 2.0-litre four-cylinder boxer petrol
OUTPUT: 152kW/212Nm
TRANSMISSION: Six-speed manual
FUEL: TBC
CO2: TBC
SAFETY RATING: Five-star ANCAP

2017 TOYOTA 86 AUTO PRICING AND SPECIFICATIONS:
PRICE: TBA (currently from $32,490)
ENGINE: 2.0-litre four-cylinder boxer petrol
OUTPUT: 147kW/205Nm
TRANSMISSION: Six-speed automatic
FUEL: TBC
CO2: TBC
SAFETY RATING: Five-star ANCAP

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>> Hyundai Veloster (from $25,050 plus ORCs)
>> Kia Cerato Koup (from $24,190 plus ORCs)
>> Mazda MX-5 (from $31,990 plus ORCs)

question: What does the text say about the Toyota 86's popularity?

answer: The Toyota 86 was a revelation when it launched in Australia in mid-2012. It returned Toyota to the budget sports car segment with a stellar blend of involving dynamics, athletic good looks, and an attainable price. The 86 has maintained its popularity with monthly sales figures that defy sports car trends.

critique: The answer should mention the 86's popularity in Japan.

critique: The first sentence does not bring in its literal sales figures.

critique: The response should include that the 86 has maintained popularity with monthly sales figures that defy sports car trends.

critique: The answer should mention that the 86 has maintained its popularity even when compared to Toyota's former affordable sports car challenger, the Celica.

question: Summarize the aesthetic improvements of the updated 86.

answer: The updated 86 has a lower, sharper front bumper cover that improves downforce and reduces aerodynamic turbulence over the wheel-wells. The vents and piston badge of the front quarter panel are omitted, replaced by a smaller, round 86 logo behind the front wheel. All models receive LED tail-lights. High-grade GTS models receive an all-aluminium bootlid spoiler and new-look 17-inch alloy wheels.

critique: The answer omits the changes to the interior.

question: What does the text say about steering wheels?

answer: Toyota's smallest-ever steering wheel is introduced, which is -3mm to 362. It has steering wheel controls added on GTS variants, and all-new upholstery - GT variants score new black cloth and GTS variants perforated a black Grandluxe and leather combination. The steering wheel is more consistent in its weighting, the revised mapping of the EPAS system tending to flatten-out the peaks and troughs the current model exhibits during heavy cornering. There's a little more assistance at all speeds, though the author doesn't say this comes at the cost of road feel.

critique: The answer should mention that the steering wheel is smaller.

critique: The answer is a summary of the text, not a description of the steering wheel.

critique: The answer should mention the new steering wheel's position.

critique: The answer is irrelevant to the question.

critique: The answer is a mess, and doesn't mention anything about steering wheels. It should be scrapped and re-written.

critique: The answer is not relevant to the question.

critique: Steering wheels are only discussed in the context of the current and new models. It is not offered on the current models.

question: What does the text say about monthly installments for payment?

answer: No answer

text: The answer should state that the text does not discuss monthly installment payments.


text:
	Kurt was taking his time walking down the street, his feet moving him ever forward as small droplets of water fell down from the sky, splashing all across the city. Everyone around him was rushing, with umbrellas, hoods, newspapers covering their heads. Kurt's sweatshirt had a hood, but he didn't think of placing it over his head. The cold orbs of water felt nice running down his shaggy brown hair, dropping off of curls in front of his face, onto his nose and then down to the ground with a “plop.” The water had just started to fall from the sky, but, unlike most times it rains, it did not start off slowly. There was no build up toward the release. One moment, no rain, the next, it felt like the massage setting on a shower head. Kurt forgot where it was he was going, but continued walking anyway, to get his feet wet. As people ran by, they looked at him oddly, as if he was insane to act as he did.
	After about thirty seconds, Kurt's clothes were soaked through. His hair was dripping completely, it looked as if head been in a shower for a few minutes. His sweatshirt clung to his body, dark gray from the moisture. In the pockets of his jeans his cell phone had short-circuited, the water had soaked into the electronics and caused too much energy to be placed on the motherboard, killing it forever. Kurt didn't care. He didn't notice that fact until a day later, when he went to clean up, and the phone fell from his pocket to the floor. His feet kept leading him down the street, which was growing increasingly familiar to Kurt, as he looked around him. He still did not know where he was going, but let his feet lead him.
	After five minutes of walking in the rain, his feet brought him in front of the door to an apartment building. The building he recalled knowing, but he did not know where from. Water still dripped down his brow to his nose, and off to make a “plop” in the puddle created under his feet. It was still raining, but a canopy provided relief. Kurt's right hand made its way to his pocket, where it found cold metal, damp from the cloth around it. The metal fit into the door in front of him, and his feet pulled him into the stair well, and up the stairs in front of him. He left a trail of water as his feet trotted up the steps, one by one.
	Everything around him he knew well, but Kurt could not figure out why. His feet had brought him in front of a door now. On the door were the numbers four, zero, and seven. His right hand lifted up, and knocked twice. The sound of flesh on wood was thick and loud, echoing down the hall. The water dripping off of Kurt soaked a floor mat that read “Welcome!” Kurt heard some shuffling inside, and the door opened. Standing there, staring at Kurt was a woman. Kurt remembered her. She stood in the doorway, wearing gray sweat pants and a t-shirt much too big for her. Her auburn hair was tied above her head in a ponytail that reached down past her shoulders. Her eyes were puffed and red. Inside the room, Kurt could see tissues and an open bottle of wine on the coffee table. He looked at her and said quietly,
	 “Angela... You're beautiful. Marry me.”
	“Fuck off.”
	Water went “plop” on the now-soaked floor mat.
	The door slammed shut, followed by the sound of metal clinking with metal.  Kurt turned, and started walking back down the stairs. As he got to the bottom, he realized that it looked brighter outside. When he walked out of the apartment, he looked up into the clouds. They were thinner. Water dripped from his nose and went “plop.” His eyes were red and puffy.

title: This is the first story I have written in the longest time. I give you: Plop

question: Summarize the climactic event of the story.

answer: Kurt arrives at an apartment building, recalling having been there before. He anticipates seeing Angela, who he is sure lives in the building, and says that he wants to marry her. Angela answers the door, and says the words he is dreading: "fuck off." She slams the door, and we hear the door lock. Kurt walks away defeated.

critique: "He anticipates seeing Angela, who he is sure lives in the building, and says that he wants to marry her." - this is incorrect. Kurt doesn't anticipate seeing Angela. He just goes to the building because his feet led him there.

critique: The answer should mention that Kurt is wet from the rain.

question: Summarize Kurt's physical path over the course of the story.

answer: Kurt was walking through the rain, and after five minutes he walked into an apartment complex. He knocked on the door of apartment 407, and Angela opened it. He asked her to marry him, and she refused him, slamming the door.

critique: The answer omits that Kurt walked out of the apartment and back into the rain.

question: What does the story say about Kurt's occupation?

answer: No answer

question: What details in the story demonstrate that the characters are unhappy?

answer: Kurt is soaking wet in the rain, his phone is dead, and he ends up in front of a woman's door. She is crying, has tissues and an open bottle of wine on her coffee table.

critique: The woman's response to Kurt's proposal is omitted.

critique: Kurt is not the only one who is unhappy. Angela is also unhappy.

critique: Not quite sure how to view the tissues and wine: clearly not a positive thing but certainly not always indicative of unhappiness.

critique: The answer should mention that the woman is not happy to see Kurt.

critique: The answer should mention that Kurt is not wearing a hood.

critique: The answer should mention that Kurt is going to propose to Angela.

critique: The woman is not crying, she just tells Kurt to fuck off.


text:
As I recall, we weren't really there. Our veins were being flooded with wine, beer and unnamed spirits that were named at the time, but I don't remember them. Despite that, everything had slowed down to an even pace. The sun stayed up forever, blinding us from being able to make eye contact across the beer garden table. We only found respite from the glare when we looked down at the black table-top to stub-out our cigarettes into the ashtrays. The flood of booze was raging, but it felt slow. Time limped away. Hours in minutes, it seemed.

We were there for a good while, though. Four hours, I think. We had witnessed the rise and fall of strange men pounding flashing buttons on the bandit. We saw them lose £50 in the space of mere seconds, and we were infuriated. What a waste, we would think. I was annoyed at you, too. At the first sign of a dwindling conversation you took your phone out of your pocket, pretending to text people. Checking the news. The latest status update. Anything to stop you from talking to me.

Outside, with the sun still punishing us, our silences were filled by sniggering at the drunks, already too drunk for this time of day, but we both knew we were no better. You asked to borrow a ciagrette, and then another, and then another, and then you would sigh when I told you I had none left. I wasn't lying, you know. I really didn't have any left. And it was because of you that I didn't.

I stumbled to the shop to buy more cigarettes. One of the strangest feelings in the world is walking around a busy town centre at two in the afternoon drunk, when you know for a fact that every single person around you is sober. They are doing their shopping, taking their kids to the local park, mooching. But your vision is swirling. It's really strange but also kind of liberating. When you see a teenager doing something stupid you feel like you can walk up to him and starting a fight. When you see a police officer you feel like you can approach them and start swearing at them. But you never do. You don't have the spine, or more, your own brain reins you in, telling you you shouldn't. And that's fine, because knowing that you can do if you want, is good enough.

I bought the wrong brand of cigs but that doesn't matter. They're cigs. Besides, they were for you, not me. This is a weird kind of drunk. Being drunk in the day time is different. It's like you're floating everywhere and not walking. There's a strong sense of independence. The spirits and whatever else running through me is probably why I didn't notice the homeless man at first. I took a double-take and walked backwards, back to him. He was on the floor, legs crossed as though he was doing street yoga. He had at least five layers on and a beanie hat despite the temperature reaching twenty. He must have been boiling. Or cold.

The homeless man asked for change. I smiled, but I was careful not to make it a pitiful smile. I gave him a £5 note but in my stupor I would only later realise that I gave him a £20 note instead. But I don't feel bad for that. Money is paper. Paper means a lot to the homeless.

I walked off but he whistled after me. For a second time now, I went back to him. He gestured for me to sit with him, and I did. I don't know why. I thought that I shouldn't because I knew you were waiting for me in the beer garden. Well, waiting for my cigarettes, not waiting for me. So I thought, sod you, you can wait. And you did, but I don't know how long for. The homeless person began rambling. I know it's a stereotype, but he did. He spoke of war, then tigers, then bread. I thought he was mad, but you can't blame him. Who wouldn't be? He spoke of hostels and free beds, but he couldn't stay at them any more. He was banned. Imagine, a homeless person banned from homeless shelters. Where can he go? And that's when he said it: He wanted to die. He could easily do it, but it would only be easy from a literal sense. After all, it isn't hard to kill yourself. What's hard is finding the backbone to go through with it. That's when I pulled my packet of cigarettes out and shared them with him and I thought, I'm not going to share these with my friend when I get back to the beer garden.

It might have been the heat. It might have been the alcohol. It might have been a mixture of the two, which is more likely. Whatever it was, I had an idea. I offered to kill him. That way, he would die like he wanted, but he wouldn't need the backbone to do it. He agreed, but he asked me for another cigarette first. I gave him one, why wouldn't I? It's kind of like his last meal. He told me that he didn't want to know how he was going to die, so I assured him it would be a surprise. I struggled to my feet, the heat was far too intense. I felt the panic of the moment when you realise you're sobering-up, so I went to the shop and bought a large bottle of cider and a small can of vodka and coke. I drank the can really quickly. It nearly came out of my nose. I lit a cigarette and went back to the homeless guy. I told him the cider was for him and he smiled like it was Christmas to a child. He asked me how I was going to kill him. I told him I already did. He looked annoyed but that's okay, he probably knew what I meant deep down.

You know what weird feeling when you're drunk in the middle of the day time and everyone else seems to be sober and the whole thing starts twisting? It's liberating. It's like a weird feeling of independence. On my way back to the pub to get back to you (you must have been waiting forever), I noticed a teenager chasing pigeons and making them fly into the faces of tutting old people. So I ran over to him and punched him square in the face. I felt one my knuckles slice open from a tooth, but I didn't feel the pain of it. The police officer I mentioned was still there, you know. He came over after hearing the commotion and when his eyes locked onto mine, you know what I said to him? I told him to go fuck himself. I laughed, probably a little too loudly, and then looked-up to the sky.

The sun was blazing. Not a cloud to be seen. It was the middle of the day and I felt like I was the only person in the town centre who was drunk. It feels weird, but in a good way. Liberating. Then I was on the ground, kissing the concrete. I felt my hands being tied together and the cold metal hugging my wrists. Then I thought of you, and you know what I did? I laughed and thought 'You can wait in the beer garden all day you son of a bitch. You aren't having my cigarettes.'

title: [RF] They Are My Cigarettes

question: What does the text say about what the narrator is doing before going to buy cigarettes?

answer: The narrator and their friend are at a beer garden, and they have been drinking wine, beer, and unnamed spirits. The narrator and their friend have been watching men with buttons playing the bandit, and they have been annoyed at the narrator's friend for not talking to the narrator.

critique: The narrator's friend is not the narrator.

critique: The narrator is annoyed at the other person because they took their phone out and pretended to text people to avoid talking to the narrator.

critique: The narrator's friend's annoyance is irrelevant.

critique: The narrator is annoyed at his friend for not talking to him.

critique: The narrator and his friend are not annoyed at each other.

critique: The sentence structure of this sentence should be edited to be fluent and make it read easier.

critique: It's omitted that they are also sniggering at the drunks.


text:
2/11/1373, 6/30/1908, 7/7/1997, 11/1/2011, 6/21/2013, 11/18/2013, ?

32492/ 6 = 5415.33 194952/365=534.115 902.55

The Bloop...

That’s what it was called at the time, The “Bloop” , because I guess we didn’t have anything better to call it. And to be honest, after reviewing the audio several times, it did kinda sound like a bloop. The kinda noise when a large volume of water is displaced all at once. We were lucky on that one, or unlucky. Maybe if we had recognized it for what it was…

I’m getting ahead of myself.

I believe it was the Olmecs that first encountered the phenomena around 1831 BCE. There’s this monument, they call it the San Martin Pajapan Monument now, that was carved in approximately that time period. The statue is early example of their artwork, showing a young lord or demi god, holding up a ceremonial bar. The general consensus is that it was a figure meant to be establishing the center of the universe. What little we can translate of their culture and writing, the statue was placed at a location that they viewed as being a place of powerful energy. Maybe they saw something in the hills between those two volcanoes. Something that defied nature. There’s no fossil or archeological evidence, but it just fits, you know? By working backwards with the math?

The first recorded incident was February 11th, 1373CE outside of what is modern day Baghdad, Iraq. I say this is the first “recorded” incident for a reason. What happened outside of the recovering city was never properly documented. The Il-Khanids, Mongol rulers of their captured Arabian lands, weren’t too keen on writing down things that didn’t involve the glory of the Mongol empire. What can be gleaned from the entire TWO historical documents concerning the event, was a massive shockwave tipped over several ships on the river, as well as toppling dozens of homes within the city. The writings from the era said that a pressure wave, described by them as “the air punched at our chests as if a forceful man ” , originating from the desert sands east of the city. I calculate the epicenter to have been 1 mile east north east of the cities’ harbor, of approximately 63 kilotons of TNT in strength, somewhat less than the destructive threshold of the atomic warhead dropped on Hiroshima by the United States during World War 2. The effects of being so close to a blast of that magnitude would have been similar to what was described by the accounts. I can consequently see why no one cared. It was not a great era of scientific curiosity. It was written off like any myriad of events during that era.

The second recorded event occurred on June 30th, 1908. Centered around 5 miles South South east of Lake Cheko, in Tunguska, Russia. I’m sure you’ve heard of that one, though. What’s more commonly known as, The Tunguska Blast. Up until last month, it was easily attributed to a rogue asteroid or cometoid exploding in mid air over the deserted forest. Official estimates vary, but the explosive force rattled windows 400 miles away. It hammered the Siberian wilds with what we now know was around 2 megatons of explosive force. Speculation was, that had such an event occurred in a populated city in that era, say for instance, Paris, London, or New York City. The death toll would have numbered in hundreds of thousands. We were “lucky” though, it was a deserted location, very few people were injured. Hell it took months for a study team to even venture out into the frozen woodlands to survey the damage back then. Again, No one really cared.

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title: Happy Early Halloween! I hope it's a fun read for you.

question: Why is the "bloop" not garnering enough attention as it should?

answer: The narrator says that it was not a great era of scientific curiosity.

critique: The answer is written in a hierarchical style that does not read well. The idea should be: no one paid attention because it doesn't seem a likely catastrophe.

critique: The narrator says this, but it's not the full answer

critique: The narrator is not the reason why the "bloop" is not garnering enough attention as it should.

critique: The answer is not related to the question.

critique: The narrator is not the one who is not garnering enough attention.

text: The narrator attributes the lack of scientific curiosity to ignorance of the first "bloop" event, and it seems that perhaps the remoteness of the second event affected the amount of attention it got, although the text ends before that's explicitly stated.


text:
The last two days had been very strange for me. I killed a man on a psycho’s lawn, and the next day, the psycho came into my office and asked if I would like to eat lunch with him. He seemed to be acting perfectly normal. I noticed his speech pattern had changed as well. He wasn’t saying “ya” or swearing anymore. Something was off. Or maybe Noah had just realized how messed what we had done was.
I put it out of my mind, and started to enjoy myself. Noah was actually very intelligent and funny. He must have been intelligent from the start, I concluded, he is a lawyer after all. He was probably just drunk for the last week. I chuckled at the thought.
We finished up our lunch, and headed out to my car. Noah said he had left his phone at my office, so I offered to take him there before I took him home. He thanked me in an uncharacteristically gratuitous way. However, I didn’t sense anything was amiss, and we got in.
Big mistake. The minute I got in the car, Noah pulled out what looked like an ingot, and bashed me across the head with it.
I woke up in a small, cramped room that I recognized as the interior of Noah’s shed.
“Took you long enough,” said Noah in a cold voice. “What the fuck?” I demanded.
“I can’t have another murderer taking advantage of Noah, now can I,” he said in that cold voice, “No, I’m going to have to kill you I suppose.”
“What? No! Noah, you don’t have to do this. I’m not going to tell anybody, you can let me go.” I knew he wasn’t going to.
“Noah’s not here right now. If you’d like to leave a message, please don’t. I screen his calls.”
Noah had finally snapped. The bastard was crazy.
I tried to reason with him, “C’mon Noah. You know you don’t have to do this!”
“I TOLD YOU I’M NOT NOAH!”
“If you’re not Noah, who are you then?”
“BELLUA.”
No. It couldn’t be. Noah had talked about Bellua so much, but always acted as Bellua was a friend or something. I finally put the pieces together.
“Yes, I can see the truth has finally dawned on you,” Noah/Bellua drawled, “Frankly, I don’t see how an idiot like you became a neurosurgeon. Let me explain it to you. I’m the original Noah. The Noah you know is simply a second personality of mine. Noah was born after I was caught in an explosion. That’s why he is so fixated on fire. I’ve been this way for as long as I can remember, but now that I have the Other Noah, it is so much easier for me to cleanse this disgusting society. The Other Noah agrees. He doesn’t have my capacity, so he uses fire as his tool. It’s crude but it works. Why, just recently he managed to rid society of a bartender who was a serial rapist. I’m much more dedicated however. I take out the real sickos. Like you. And Other Noah will dispose of your body. You pretend to kill only bad people, but what about the little girl who you kidnapped and did unspeakable things to? What about the man you decapitated for fun? ANSWER ME? Why’d did you do it? Did you have any reason? NO! I may be a monster, but I know that! People like you, who pretend to be infallible, make me sick!”
My cheeks were so cold. I couldn’t believe it. How did he know all this?
I knew I was going to die. I began to say an Our Father.
“YES. This reaction. I love it!” Noah/Bellua bellowed, “The ‘prayer,’ as if pretending to repent to an entity you’ve never believed in will make it all better. Using religion as a fair-weather friendship with God, I love it! But why bother praying to God now? I control your life now: I am your God. Pray to me!”
I said nothing. Noah/Bellua began to pace, muttering something under his breath.
“What?” I said.
“Squares!” He murmured a little louder,
I realized what he was doing: getting ready to kill me. Finally, I closed my eyes, went limp,  and gave up.
But he wouldn’t let me do that. He yanked up into a sitting position forcefully, and suddenly I felt metal being pressed down, then a sharp pain in the back of my neck. He wouldn’t stop. It felt like he was cutting something out. When he finished, he showed me what he had done. The square piece of my skin he had cut out was dripping with my blood.
“And now, I must bid you adieu,” Noah/Bellua whispered into my ear. And all was dark.

title: Bellua (Original Short Story by Me) p.3 Rust (Final Part)

question: Why does Bellua hate the narrator so much?

answer: Bellua believes the narrator is a monster who pretends to be a good person. Bellua believes that the narrator is sick and that he should be disposed of.

critique: "Bellua believes" - replace with "Because"

critique: "Bellua believes that the narrator is sick and that he should be disposed of." - redundant and can be deleted.

critique: The answer should mention the narrator's crimes.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator has done bad things.

critique: The narrator is a monster, but he's not pretending to be a good person.


text:
Mason’s brush arched and swirled with the careful elegance of a conductor, the foxtail bristles leaving swaths of scarlet across the snow white canvas. He was careful not to make a single mistake, as he only had so much material to paint with. He bit to lower left corner of his lip, his right eye half shut in concentration, as he pushed himself to perfection. He had been practicing for this moment his entire life.

He had familiarized himself with the tool he was using, practicing with it at great lengths. He had sacrificed some of his physical and mental well-being to obtain the flawless technique he would be using today. He felt that his entire life had led to this moment… and perhaps it had.

He had gone so many days without eating over his years of practice that he was not diverted by the smells wafting up through the wooden boards of his room in the Brass Wolf Inn. Even though tonight was the village’s Spring Festivus he was still working undistracted. The odors that were once mouth-watering and intoxicating no longer pulled him away from his work. The earthy scents with a biting pinch from the spiced mead, the subtle call of the peppercorn venison, the sweetly suffocating weight of a bulb of honey-buttered onion, and the familiar memory that accompanied the yeasty allure of freshly baked and airy loaves of bread… none of these held power over him anymore.

This was quite a lot to say for a penniless man on a holiday where the last meal of the night was free. Every copper, every bit every talent he owned, earned, or inherited went into the Painter’s Guild at Ivanhill. Though he had learned so much more after he was expelled and sentenced to a trial, having been taught by the natural flow of the forest when he fled the great city with nothing but a bedroll, a foxtail brush and linen canvas (both stolen), and the clothes on his back.

He had crafted his own paints in the countryside by stealing flour from mills and mixing it with both cold and boiled water and introducing colored clay into the mixture until it was the consistency he needed to paint with. In larger cities he would spend any collected alms on linseed oil and chalk, powdering the latter and mixing the two until he had oil paint to aid in his work and education. Both of these paints he would practice with by painting with his coattail or fingers upon rocks and trees, learning how to use a single color and the pressure upon the strokes of his instruments to create a half-dozen different shades.

The things he painted were elaborate and detailed, having only dense jungle and active wildlife as subjects. He learned to paint both quickly and slowly, to take an image and capture it in the flash before it was gone or to notice small details and slowly work them into the boulders and oak trunks he worked on. With all of his schooling and practical experience, with his hardships and determination, Mason had become a fantastic artist.

Now here he was at the end of the long road he had been traveling. His stolen canvas held aloft by the window, the brush matted in crimson. His hands did not shake, his brow did not sweat, and he breathed as he should rather than holding his breath with each stroke. He exuded confidence, it poured from his posture and movements and began to flood the room as if it were water. Soon it would leak into the floorboard and drip on those below and they would come up to his room to see what force they were beholding.

That was what they did.

Just as Mason had finished the last stroke, he stepped backwards and smiled at the canvas. His work was finished. After all he had gone through he was finally free of the images trapped in his head, he had finally had given life to them. The lines and curves breathed in their first breath of completion upon the canvas as the door to Mason’s room burst open.

Mason was seized by his shoulders and throw to the floor as three men entered the room. One man pinned him down as the others examined the painting with horror. They screamed in his ears – large and powerful fists came down upon his face and broke his nose. Paint poured from his nostrils as the fists continued to come down, smashing his teeth into his mouth and down his throat. Mason gulped for air and swallowed a molar in the chaos.

He was hoisted to his feet and thrown against the back wall, his head slamming into the wood. He stared in shock and horror as flint and steel were brought in. The metal shriek of the tools spat sparks upon the canvas until it began to blaze. Mason watched his life’s work turn to smoke and heat and flames. He was not even given the courtesy of watching it die as it was thrown out of the window and into the streets below where it smoldered into ash away from its creator’s eyes.

Mason screamed and thrashed and wept as they dragged him away. He begged for answers as to why they would treat him and his work so cruelly, for all he had painted was a field of flowers, butterflies, and a beautiful woman standing among them. His art was nearly clichéd, merely done in a more professional manner than most men could achieve.

He was told he knew why as he was taken to the jail to be tried and executed. He was clubbed over the head and his world went dark. The last vision he had of the room in which his masterpiece was created was his palette lying on the floor and a woman kneeling over it, crying, as men tried to console her or drag her away…

title: [OC] "The Painter" - a quick 1,000 words as a writing exercise.

question: What does the story say about Mason's family?

answer: No answer

critique: The response misses to provide an answer to the task.

critique: This is an incorrect response and the correct response needs to be added.

question: What does the story say about Mason?

answer: Mason is a penniless man who is a member of the Painter's Guild at Ivanhill. He was expelled and sentenced to a trial. Mason fled the city with nothing but a bedroll, a foxtail brush, and a linen canvas. He crafted his own paints by stealing flour from mills and mixing it with water and clay. He learned to paint both quickly and slowly. Mason was sentenced to death for killing a woman and was executed.

critique: It's omitted that Mason's work was burned.

critique: The answer should mention that Mason is a talented artist.

critique: The answer should mention that Mason is a fantastic artist.

critique: The answer should mention that Mason is an artist.

text: The reason why Mason was sentenced to death was because of his painting. he did not kill a woman.

category: accuracy

question: What drove the people to beat, arrest, and execute Mason?

answer: Mason was a painter who was driven to create his masterpiece. He was penniless and had to steal to survive. He was expelled from the Painter's Guild and sentenced to a trial. He fled the city with nothing but a bedroll, a foxtail brush, and a linen canvas. He crafted his own paints by stealing flour from mills and mixing it with water and clay. He learned to paint both quickly and slowly, to take an image and capture it in the flash before it was gone or to notice small details and slowly work them into the boulders and oak trunks he worked on. He was a fantastic artist. He created a masterpiece that was so beautiful that the people were driven to beat, arrest, and execute him.

critique: The answer should mention that Mason was caught in the act of painting.

critique: The first sentence is irrelevant to the question.

critique: The answer is a summary of Mason's life and the events that led to his arrest. It is not the reason why the people beat, arrest, and execute Mason.

critique: The answer is a summary of Mason's life, not an answer to the question.

critique: The answer is a summary of Mason's life, not the reason why he was beaten, arrested, and executed.

critique: a person named Mason is never said to be a painter. at best it is implied he is a painter.

question: Why was Mason upset at the men who beat and dragged him away?

answer: He was upset because they destroyed his painting.

critique: The answer should mention that Mason was upset because the men destroyed his painting without telling him why.

critique: It is omitted that he was upset because they destroyed his painting without reason.

critique: The answer should mention that Mason was upset because he didn't know why the men destroyed his painting.

critique: As mentioned, the story did not provide the reason.

critique: The answer should mention Mason's confusion.

critique: Mason was upset because they destroyed his painting and they did not explain why they did it.


text:
ALLEN ROGER SNYDER (born January 26, 1946) is an American lawyer and a former nominee to the U.S. Court of Appeals for the District of Columbia Circuit.

Education and legal training

Snyder earned a bachelor's degree with distinction from George Washington University in 1967 and a J.D. degree _magna cum laude_ from Harvard Law School in 1971. He clerked for Supreme Court justices John Marshall Harlan II in 1971 and William Rehnquist in 1972.

Professional career

Snyder joined the Washington, D.C. law firm Hogan & Hartson in 1972 as an associate and later became a partner. During Bill Clinton's presidency, Snyder represented Deputy White House Counsel Bruce Lindsey during the Whitewater controversy. In addition, Snyder represented actress Elizabeth Taylor, successfully blocking an ABC-TV docudrama about her life, according to a September 2004 article about Hogan & Hartson in the Washingtonian magazine. And Snyder represented Netscape as its chief corporate attorney during its antitrust fight against Microsoft.[1]

Nomination to the U.S. Court of Appeals for the District of Columbia Circuit

On September 22, 1999, President Clinton nominated Snyder to the U.S. Court of Appeals for the District of Columbia Circuit to replace the seat held by the retiring Patricia Wald. Although he is a Democrat, Snyder's nomination initially was thought to be fairly uncontroversial, particularly given his long history as a Washington insider and his support from conservatives like Rehnquist, Sen. John Warner, and former appeals court judge Robert Bork. His nomination even received a hearing from the Senate Judiciary Committee in May 2000. However, with Republicans in control of the U.S. Senate and a presidential election looming, Snyder's nomination languished. Ultimately, the Senate chose not to vote on the D.C. Circuit nominations of both Snyder and Elena Kagan. Republican senators claimed that there was some question over whether those D.C. Circuit seats were even necessary, while Democratic senators charged that the Republican leadership in the Senate was trying to keep those two seats open until after the presidential election so that they could be filled with Republican appointees.

In 2001, President George W. Bush nominated Miguel Estrada to the seat to which Snyder had been nominated. Estrada's nomination ran into opposition from Democratic senators, and he withdrew his name from further consideration in early September 2003. Bush subsequently nominated Thomas B. Griffith to that D.C. Circuit seat in 2004, and he was confirmed by the U.S. Senate in 2005.

Later

After Snyder's nomination died, he resigned his partnership at Hogan & Hartson and took early retirement, according to a _New York Times_ article on August 11, 2002. “Senator Specter congratulated me on how well things had gone and told me he was confident I would be confirmed and told me I would be a great judge,” Snyder told the Times. “And then the committee never took a vote.” Snyder, who is known to be close friends with Chief Justice John G. Roberts, is a longtime resident of Bethesda, Maryland.[2]

Personal life

On August 10, 1969, Snyder married Jean Port. He and his wife served as emergency foster parents for several years and eventually adopted another daughter from the foster care system.[3] In 2011, Snyder was approached by Children's Law Center, the largest legal services organization in the District of Columbia,[4] which works to achieve permanency and stability for children. Snyder joined Children's Law Center to work on appellate cases and strategy. He encourages other lawyers near- or post-retirement to consider similar positions. “There is a great unmet need in the community for pro bono service,” Snyder told _The National Law Journal_. “For a retiring lawyer, it is an opportunity to carve out a niche of the law that you care about.”[5]

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title: Allen Snyder (lawyer)

question: What does the text say about the academic process of becoming a lawyer?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention Snyder's education and legal training.

critique: The question asks specifically about Snyder's education, so that should be the content of the answer.

critique: The question is asking for information about the academic process of becoming a lawyer. The text does not have any information on this.

question: What does the text say about the highlights of Allen Snyder's professional career?

answer: Allen Snyder joined the Washington, D.C. law firm Hogan & Hartson in 1972 as an associate and later became a partner. During Bill Clinton's presidency, Snyder represented Deputy White House Counsel Bruce Lindsey during the Whitewater controversy. In addition, Snyder represented actress Elizabeth Taylor and Netscape.

critique: The response should include Snyder's nomination to the U.S. Court of Appeals for the District of Columbia Circuit.

critique: The answer should mention Snyder's nomination to the U.S. Court of Appeals for the District of Columbia Circuit.

critique: The answer omits Snyder's nomination to the U.S. Court of Appeals for the District of Columbia Circuit.

critique: Snyder's position on taking early retirement does not belong in the answer.

critique: It's omitted that Snyder was nominated to the U.S. Court of Appeals for the District of Columbia Circuit by President Clinton in 1999.

question: What does the text say about the effects Republican control of the U.S. Senate had with regards to Snyder's appointment to the U.S. Court of Appeals?

answer: Snyder's nomination to the U.S. Court of Appeals was thought to be uncontroversial. However, with Republicans in control of the U.S. Senate and a presidential election looming, Snyder's nomination languished. Ultimately, the Senate chose not to vote on the D.C. Circuit nominations of both Snyder and Elena Kagan. Republican senators claimed that there was some question over whether those D.C. Circuit seats were even necessary, while Democratic senators charged that the Republican leadership in the Senate was trying to keep those two seats open until after the presidential election so that they could be filled with Republican appointees.

critique: The answer should mention that Snyder's nomination was withdrawn.

critique: The answer should mention that Snyder's nomination was blocked.

critique: The answer should mention that Snyder's nomination was eventually withdrawn.

critique: The answer is a little unclear about the effects of Republican control of the U.S. Senate.

critique: Remove the first sentence, it is not relevant

critique: The sentence about Democratic senators' accusations is irrelevant.

question: What does the text say about Snyder's personal life, education, and legal training?

answer: Snyder earned a bachelor's degree with distinction from George Washington University in 1967 and a J.D. degree from Harvard Law School in 1971. He clerked for Supreme Court justices John Marshall Harlan II in 1971 and William Rehnquist in 1972.

critique: The answer should mention Snyder's personal life.

critique: The answer omits Snyder's marriage and his work with Children's Law Center.

critique: Snyder's personal life is irrelevant to the question.

critique: The answer should mention Snyder's marriage and children.

critique: The answer omits Snyder's personal life.

critique: The model's insufficient answer should mention Snyder first marriage.

critique: The answer should mention Snyder's marriage and the adoption of a daughter.