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I'm taking a story writing class and this is my first short story. Can I get some honest critiques?

I kneeled down onto the dusty, wooden floor and scrubbed with all of my might. The veins in my arms bulged and the floor creaked under me, but I could not get the blood stain out from the night before. Papa had been drinking all day yesterday and decided to slice Peter, our brother, on his cheek with a sharp blade. There was no reason behind it, I’m sure, but these days he didn’t need a reason to lash out on any of us.  I wiped the sweat off of my furrowed brow and tried even harder.  I heard faint footsteps in the distance and silently hoped it was not my father.

“Zoya!” my father yelled sternly. He was a former Soviet soldier; a tall, burly man who smelled of vodka and musk.  “Yes, papa?” I lifted the greasy mop of black hair from my face and looked straight at him. He tugged me by my tattered collar and got within an inch of my face. “I am so fucking sick of this dirty house. You’ve been on this floor for 3 hours and you haven’t even cleaned up a damn thing.” I muttered an apology and his face contorted with anger. He grunted at me and said “You are absolutely worthless to me, little girl. Your existence has wasted sixteen years of my life.”

He dragged me out of the hallway to the back of the house where he usually sat and drank silently. He lifted my skirt and with four fluid movements, he whacked my bottom with his “special belt.” The belt was passed down to him by his father.  It was made of cracked leather and had fourteen razorblades wedged into the side of it, which left horrible cuts if you were ever punished with it.  When he was finished, he shoved me to the side. I straightened my skirt and rushed back to the kitchen to finish cleaning.

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Mama and Papa were so irrevocably in love with each other and they were proud of the family that they had together. Papa worked in the factory and Mama stayed at home to clean and take care of the children. We’d spend our afternoons in the park singing, talking about the old days, and Mama would tell us the same old story about the day she met Papa. Tears would well up in her eyes and you could tell just how much she loved him. There was never a day when Papa came home from work without a warm welcoming from everyone. Mama’s eyes would light up and all of the children would run into his arms. Life was perfect.

Life changed drastically when she died. It was the summer of nineteen ninety-four and she had just given birth to our sister Irina. We knew something was wrong the day they both came back from the hospital. Mama didn’t even want to hold her and refused to do anything but sit in her room. Day after day, for about a month, she’d just sit in front of her window crying. She wouldn’t speak or eat and there was not a doctor in town that could tell us what was wrong with her.

One evening, after having spent all day in the park with my brother, I walked into my house and saw a sight that I would never forget for the rest of my life. The putrid smell of death overcame me and as I stepped into the washroom; I saw my mother. She had been lying there for the entire latter half of the day and her nightdress was stained with coagulated blood. Her body, limp and lifeless, was pale and covered in tiny flecks of what we thought was her brain. Her head had been blown into tiny chunks that littered the side of the wall and in one of her arms was Papa’s old hunting rifle. I dropped to my knees, laid my head in her lap, and cried until Papa came home.

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That was the day that everything changed for us. Papa had to bury the love of his life and was left with 3 children to take care of. He quit his job and started drinking, leaving Peter and I to pick up the slack. I stayed at home with Peter; we cleaned, cooked, and took care of Irina; but matter what we did, Papa would always find fault in it. If he was even remotely angry,  he would take it out on us. He’d find the nearest thing he could use as a weapon and beat us senselessly.

It has been this way for seven years now. It seems as though every day is getting worse and worse. Sometimes I think that I’d rather die than be subject to his wrath.

About two hours later, I finally cleaned up the last bit of Peter’s blood off of the floor. I shoved my cleaning supplies into the cupboard under the sink and shuffled towards the garden behind the house. Peter and Irina were in the garden scooping potatoes out of the soil with their bare hands. “Hey, what are you up to?” I said, he looked at me solemnly. I tousled his shaggy brown hair then picked Irina up and placed her in my lap. “Papa beat you again, didn’t he?” he asked. “Yeah, but it isn’t like it’s the first time. Plus, it was kind of my fault anyway. I just couldn’t get the floor clean.” He stood up and looked down at me. “Are you really that stupid? You think it is okay for him to do that shit to you?” He scoffed and stormed into the house, slamming the door behind him. I looked down at the earth beneath me. Tears fell down my face and quickly disappeared into the soil. Irina wiped a tear away from my face and smiled at me.

Her smile turned into a twisted face of horror within two seconds. Papa was stumbling violently out of the house with his infamous belt. He had been drinking again and I couldn’t understand a word of his drunken tirade. He lashed Irina right in the face, ripping her delicate skin off. He grabbed a hold of her neck, bent her over the fence, and smacked her again and again. I tried blocking her from his lashings, but he threw me to the side and kept on going. Her violent screams faded into soft whimpers. I peered over at her little blonde curls that were stained with blood. Her fair skin was cut to pieces and Papa would not let go of his grip on her neck. “Papa, you’re going to kill her! Stop!” I yelled, as I lunged over to protect her. He started to beat me with the belt; the razorblades cutting into my sides sent searing pain throughout my whole body. I looked down at Irina’s limp body and brushed the hair out of her face. Her eyes were swollen shut and her face was unrecognizable. I put my hand to her heart and it was not beating. I began sobbing uncontrollably. “You fucking killed her, Papa! Why?” I held her in my arms and looked up at him. He stared blankly at me for what seemed like forever. His lips began to quiver and a single tear dropped down his old, worn out face.

Out of nowhere, I heard the distinct sound of Papa’s old hunting rifle being cocked. Three loud shots rang out and Papa dropped to the ground.

if you've made it this far, thanks for reading. i appreciate it.

title: Toska (My first short story)

question: Summarize the narrator's feelings towards the life she had and what she thought about the beatings her and her siblings got.

answer: The narrator's life and family are extremely dysfunctional. She describes her carefree, happy childhood before her mother's passing and says their father, the only parent they had left, became abusive and began drinking. Her father was abusive to her and her siblings, beat them with his "special belt" every time he got upset, which made them all feel they had no value and that they would be better off dead if it led to him ceasing the beatings, which always happened when he was drunk. She feels badly about the beatings she has caused her father, but is upset the way he takes out his drunken rage on her siblings.

critique: The narrator's father isn't abusive towards her.

critique: The narrator's feelings about the beatings are not expressed in the story.

critique: "She describes her carefree, happy childhood before her mother's passing and says their father, the only parent they had left, became abusive and began drinking." - the mother has already died before their violent life began. Rewrite the sentence to include the narrator's current state.

critique: Mention the narrator's feelings towards the beatings

critique: The narrator isn't upset that her father takes out his rage on her siblings; she feels badly about the beatings she has caused her father.

text: The answer inaccurately mentions that the narrator felt bad about the beatings she caused her father. She did not cause beatings.

question: If the narrator's Papa was shot to death, would the narrator and siblings feel better?

answer: No answer

critique: This is a yes/no question, so the answer should be a simple yes/no response.

critique: The story does not answer this question.

critique: "mercy" would be the one word to describe the narrator and siblings’ feelings. If the Papa was shot, the narrator and her siblings would feel grateful towards the one who shot him because it saved them from more abuse and being killed.


split: train

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--Prologue--

	I never wanted this... I thought by leaving Earth I could escape the shitty lot in life I had, but boy was I wrong. I’ve been hopping from colony to colony to for about a year now. First I tried to find some work on several lunar colonies, to no avail. Then I hitched a ride out to Mars on the little credit I had left. I was able to scrape enough money to get to Ceres, where I found work for one of the science research teams there. I really enjoyed Ceres, I could have stayed there for quite a while, but just like everything else that’s ever gone right for me, it was crushed. An experiment involving a miniscule amount of anti-matter while I was off-duty completely destroyed our lab, putting me out of work, thankfully I had made enough off of my research to finally get me to Jupiter. That’s where I’m headed now, to a Jovian Platform, one devoted to science and discovery, one where I will strive.

--The Seventh Column--

	“The Seventh Column will be departing in 10 standard minutes.” announced the robotic voice of the loudspeaker, though I could hardly hear it. It’s loud here on Mars, far different than Ceres, where it was quiet and peaceful. I had to return to Mars to find a ship that could take me to Jupiter, big ships like that never stop at Ceres. The Seventh Column was the cheapest ride I could find, well within my tight budget of 6 billion credits. I already had a job waiting for me on the Jovian Platform Scipio, a well paying job researching anti-matter physics, just like on Ceres. The only difference is that Scipio has real funding, with much better equipment than I could’ve dreamed of on Ceres.

	“The Seventh Column will be departing in 5 standard minutes.”came from the loudspeaker as I checked and made sure I had everything, when I heard footsteps. I was on a fairly empty flight, with plenty of room for everyone to stay away from each other. There was no reason for anyone to be near me, and judging by the number of footsteps, this was a group of people. I looked up, and three men were standing in front of me. Rugged, worn by space travel, they had probably never seen the light of Earth.

	“Are you Isav Re’e?” asked the man on my right, who stood slightly behind the man in the center, who was clearly the leader.

	“Yes, that I am.” I said. “Why?” This wasn’t looking good, they were using one of my old aliases.

	“We’ve been looking for you... You were stupid to come back here.” said the man on my left, who I began to recognize. The tattoo on the right side of his neck gave him away, it was the symbol of the male, with a dot in the center. He was from the Maln Clan, who I worked for briefly before I left Mars the first time. I left on not so pleasant terms, too.

	“Shuttup, Ronin.” said the center man. “Look, Young, we don’t want a mess here. Come with us peacefully and we’ll make sure you aren’t hurt. If you don’t comply then... I can’t guarantee your safety.” I was in a bind, I had less than five minutes so if I left I’d miss the flight, and lose my job on Jupiter, but if I tried to stay, these guys would drag me out by force. I needed to act quickly.

	“Alright, just let me get my things, I’ve got a bag in the back.” I lied. I got up and started walking to the cargo bay, where no-one was stationed.

	“Alright, just hurry up, we don’t got all day.” said Ronin, as they began to follow me back. They had taken the bait, now I just had to reel them in. I did some quick mental predictions and chose the one with the best chances. I reached up and grabbed a large bag, and as I pulled it down I slammed it into Ronin’s face, knocking him out instantly. I dove behind a shelf and grabbed another bag, this one a little smaller, perfect to use with one hand. I waited for the other two to round the corner until I threw the bag at the other cronnie while I tripped the leader. As soon as his head hit the ground I slammed my fist upwards into his nose, killing him. I did the same to Ronin and the other one, and stuffed their bodies in a small nook of an access corridor.

	I got back to my seat as two crew members were coming towards me. They were asking all the passengers about something, tickets I guess. I was still trying to process what had just happened, when they approached me.

	“Excuse me sir, have you seen these three men on the ship?” the crewman, whose I.D. badge read Aman, showed me a Holopane with the image of the three men who attacked me. My face went hot, my head started spinning, but I was able to compose myself.

	“No, why?” I replied.

	“They requested to come see someone on the ship, but we didn’t see them come out.” said the second man, whose I.D. badge read Czevk.

	“Can’t you check the surveillance to see if they did come out?”

	“Afraid not, cameras broken. That’s why we’re asking the passengers. Everyone else said they saw them, but you didn’t, correct?” said Czevk.

	“That’s right, sir.” I replied, I was starting to sweat.

	“Alright, well, I guess they didn’t come this far back. They’re probably hiding somewhere up front.” said Aman.

	“Maybe they slipped by you and you didn’t notice. You guys were preparing to set off right?”

	“Yeah, that’s true...” said Aman looking over at Czevk. “Ah, fuck it, let’s go. I’m ready to get out of here.” He looked back at me, “Thanks for co-operating, Mr.?”

	“Young. Dr. Isais Carson Young.” I replied.

	“Thank you, Dr. Young.” said Aman, who then walked off with Czevk.

	“We apologize for the wait, The Seventh Column will now be departing from Docking Bay 823.B heading for Jupiter’s Orbital Station.” announced the loudspeaker as the ship began to hum. I had grown accustomed to the feeling over the past two years, but it never ceased to please me. It calmed me down so much it was amusing. Nothing like soaring through the vacuum of space at the speed of light to soothe the nerves.

title: The Seventh Column

question: Summarize the different work stations the narrator went through.

answer: The narrator first tried to find work on several lunar colonies, but was unsuccessful. He then hitched a ride out to Mars on the little credit he had left. He scraped enough money to get to Ceres, where he found work for one of the science research teams there. He was able to scrape enough money to get to Jupiter, where he had a job waiting for him on the Jovian Platform Scipio.

critique: The answer does not mention the narrator's work on the Maln Clan.

critique: The narrator's work on Ceres is omitted.

question: Describe the narrator's actions as they were approached by the three rugged men.

answer: The narrator first feigns compliance for the purpose of buying time to come up with a plan and then has a quick bit of self-defense training with the bag he had grabbed. He completes the plan by taking out three men while they were focused on berating him. All this is to complete his plan of getting to work on Jupiter.

critique: The narrator was never accosted prior to the recon mission by the three men.

question: Will Jupiter's Orbital Station be the last station for the narrator to stay on or will the narrator go somewhere else in the future?

answer: The narrator will probably stay on Jupiter's Orbital Station for the time being.

critique: The narrator is going to the Jovian Platform Scipio, which is a station devoted to science and discovery.

critique: The passage does not answer the question.


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Welcome to 365 Days of Motoring

An Everyday Journey Through Motoring History, Facts & Trivia

Belt up and enjoy this 365-day ride as you cruise past the most momentous motoring events in history. Packed with fascinating facts about races, motorists and the history of the mighty engine, this is a must-visit web site for any car enthusiast.

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Sunday 16th October 1955

65 years ago

Stirling Moss and Peter Collins won the Targa Florio driving a Mercedes 300 SL. The race was held over 13 laps of the 44.64 miles of the Circuito delle Madonie Piccolo, giving a distance of 581.604 miles. Each team of drivers was expected to navigate approximately 10,000 curves during almost 10 hours of driving combined. The Daimler team manager, Alfred Neubauer was planning on each driving being able to run four lap stints. The first car, an Alfa Romeo 1900 TI started off at 07:00, with subsequent cars departing every 30 seconds. The first of the main competitors, the Ferrari 750 Monza driven by Luigi Piotti and Franco Cornacchia would leave at 07:24:30. Very quickly, Moss set a blistering pace and broke the track record by two and a half minutes. Although his Mercedes was one of the last to be flagged off, he had passed everyone by the end of lap one. Castellotti's Ferrari split the Mercedes of Moss and Fangio. At the end of the fourth lap Castellotti was in first place and Moss was in a ditch. Moss had crashed but the Mercedes was still in working order if slightly bruised. After help from some spectators Moss was back on the road but now in fourth place. Collins exchanged places with Moss and took up the chase. Fangio passed the leading Ferrari and handed his car to Kling. Mercedes were now in first, third and fourth. The Mercedes of Moss and Collins would certainly have its fair share of obvious moments, scattered all around the car’s body. Still, it was going very fast. The area around the headlights were badly damaged, front corners on both sides were stripped away. And the right side panel looked as though they had had a number of encounters with buildings as the two Englishmen pushed the 300SLR hard through the Sicilian countryside. On one occasion, Moss pushed at a bit too hard and would go careening off the side of the track. The car avoided heavy damage, and with the help of some local spectators, Moss would rejoin the race, still leading. Trouble struck again when Collins drove straight up a stone wall, his front wheels spinning in the air. Fortunately he was able to put his car in reverse and rejoined the battle. Collins worked his way up to first before returning the car to Moss. Moss drove the only way that he knew how and won going away or in the words of Peter Collins "despite Stirling's efforts and my own to write the machine off!" Mercedes won the race and with it the sports car championship only to quit racing for the second time. As a result, car number 104 (Daimler-Benz AG), took an impressive victory, winning in a time of 9hrs 43.14 mins., averaging a speed of 59.832 mph. Second place went to Fangio and Kling, for the second race in a row, 4mins and 41 seconds adrift. The podium was complete by the Ferrari 860 Monza of Castellotti and Manzon, a further 5mins 25 behind. Meanwhile, the third Mercedes of Titterington and Fitch were fourth. Next home was the first of the Maserati’s, in hand of Carlos Manzini and Francesco Giardini.

[Peter Collins and Stirling Moss - Targa Florio - 1955]

Peter Collins and Stirling Moss - Targa Florio - 1955

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question: What does the text say about Ford?

answer: No answer

critique: The response misses to provide an answer to the task.

critique: The answer should mention that the text does not mention Ford.

question: What does the text say about the Targa Florio?

answer: The Targa Florio was a race held in October 1955 at the Circuito delle Madonie Piccolo. The race was held over 13 laps and each team of drivers was expected to navigate 10,000 curves during almost 10 hours of driving combined. The Targa Florio was won by Stirling Moss and Peter Collins, driving a Mercedes 300 SL.

critique: The answer should mention that the race was won by Mercedes.

critique: The answer could mention that the Targa Florio was a sports car championship.

question: What does the text say about the teams that participated in the Targa Florio in 1955?

answer: The Daimler team manager, Alfred Neubauer was planning on each driver able to run four lap stints. The first car, an Alfa Romeo 1900 TI started off at 07:00, with subsequent cars departing every 30 seconds. The first of the main competitors, the Ferrari 750 Monza driven by Luigi Piotti and Franco Cornacchia would leave at 07:24:30. Moss passed everyone by the end of lap one. Castellotti's Ferrari split the Mercedes of Moss and Fangio. At the end of the fourth lap Castellotti was in first place and Moss was in a ditch. Collins exchanged places with Moss and took up the chase.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

question: What does the text say about 365 Days of Motoring?

answer: 365 Days of Motoring is an everyday journey through motoring history, facts and trivia.

critique: It is omitted that the author is Stirling Moss.

text: The response fails to mention that 365 Days of Motoring is a website about cars.

category: coverage


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BENJAMIN JAMES PEREZ ABLAO JR. (born ) is an independent (indie film) filmmaker and actor from the United States. He is the founder of B.P.A. Productions Group, Inc., a registered corporation with the State of Delaware. Not limited to any one particular genre, he has produced award-winning films ranging from comedy [1] to drama[2] to artistic[3] to horror.[4]

Biography

Early life and education

Benjamin P. Ablao Jr. was born in Wilmington, Delaware to Benjamin P. Ablao Sr. and Angelita P. Ablao. He is the oldest of two children, with a sister named Betsy. His parents were both of Filipino heritage, with his father being from the Philippine capital, Manila, and mother from the Philippine “summer capital”, Baguio.

His parents were experienced professionals in their careers. His father was a civil engineer for a private firm until his retirement in 2007, and his mother was a Medical Technologist for the State of Delaware until her retirement in 2006. His parents were active members with a local Filipino organization, the Pilipino American Association of Delaware (“PAAD”)1, which was very active in the performance arts and heritage celebration. His experiences growing up in the small town of Claymont, a northern suburb of Wilmington, and his early exposure to performing in school/organization talent shows would eventually resurface again in his later life.

As a young boy, Ablao sang in school talent shows and performed in PAAD-sponsored Holiday / Talent events. His sister also performed for similar events and many times they sang duets together. He and his sister also took piano lessons at the urging of their mother.

After high school, he enrolled at the University of Delaware as an International Relations major and continued his education there until he transferred to Widener University in 1997. He obtained his Bachelor of Science degree and Certificate in Paralegal Studies in 2003.

He is currently working to obtain his Masters in Business Administration from the University of Phoenix-Philadelphia (PA) campus.

Journalism

Ablao attended Wilmington's Salesianum School and took many courses in public policy, government and business. He was a member of several student organizations including Model United Nations, Stage Crew and The Review, the high school's newspaper.

He also served during his junior and senior years as Acting Editor-in-Chief, Managing Editor, Art Director, and journalist for The Eye Magazine, a statewide student-run monthly magazine published by the Resource Center of the YMCA of Delaware2 until 1992. Because of his dedication and commitment to the magazine, the YMCA of Delaware named him a “1991 Youth Volunteer of the Year” recipient and was asked to and served on the Board of Directors for the Resource Center of the YMCA of Delaware3 from 1992 through 1993.

Upon graduation from high school, he attended the University of Delaware where he served as the Propraetor (Alumni Secretary) for the Kappa Delta Rho Fraternity4 (AB Chapter) in 1994,and was responsible for the organization and publication of the fraternity newsletter. From 2000 through 2002, Ablao served as President of the Kappa Delta Rho Alumni Corporation 5 (AB Chapter) and Editor-in-Chief of the bi-annual Alumni Newsletter.

Film Beginnings & Awards

While working in a financial services company in 2001, Ablao met director Anthony Spadaccini. In what started out initially as providing input for several film clips has grown and developed into a strong business relationship and personal friendship.[5] Eventually Spadaccini, under the Fleet Street Films label, combined with the support from Ablao, under the B.P.A. Productions label. Fleet Street Films is a subsidiary and the independent film productions studio of B.P.A. Productions Group.

Ablao has produced several short and feature films including: “Emo Pill” (2006)6, “Aftermath” (2005)7 and “Hatred” (2006)8.

The short film “Monday Morning” (2005) 9 (a tribute to the Chaplin/Keaton silent comedies) has played at numerous film festivals in the U.S. & Canada since 2005, and won 2nd place for Best Experimental Short at the 2006 Indie Gathering Film Festival.[6] “The First Date” (2006) 10, the follow-up to “Monday Morning”, won Best Experimental Short at the 2007 Indie Gathering Film Festival.[7] Similarly the critically acclaimed experimental short “Emo Pill”, distinguished for its beautiful & haunting imagery, has played at several festivals in the U.S. & Canada, debuting at the 2006 Newark Film Festival and winning 3rd Place for Best Experimental Short at the 2007 Indie Gathering Film Festival.[8]

Exemplary Filmmaking awards were issued for both “Emo Pill” and “Monday Morning” at the 2006 Delaware Valley Film Festival.

Including “Emo Pill,” “Aftermath,” “Hatred,” and “Monday Morning,” Ablao has served as executive producer for a multitude of other productions: “Unstable” (2005)11, “The Troubled Interviewee” (2002)12, “Glenville: Hell’s Homecoming” (2005)13, “Head Case" (2007)14 and “Amateur Porn Star Killer 2” (2008)15.

Ablao's acting credits include the horror short “En Passant”, all by award-winning filmmaker Johnny K. Wu, and Spadaccini's “Hatred”, “The First Date”, and “Head Case.”

The latest feature film, “Head Case” (a horror pseudo-documentary), premiered at the 3rd annual Newark Film Festival, which drew in the largest crowd for a local independent film for the second straight year.

Ablao has made special appearances on the local & regional media circuit such as WVUD, the University of Delaware student radio [9] and was a guest speaker for independent film production at Wilmington College in 2006.

Ablao is currently working on promoting “Head Case”, as well as producing three feature films simultaneously. In addition, he is producing a music video for Chris Watson (a contestant on the 7th season of American Idol).

[1] Benjamin P. Ablao Jr

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[5] Bothum, Peter. Indie Filmmakers Banking On A Bright Future. (Wilmington, Delaware), The News Journal, 2 April 2006, Pg. 2,

[6] 2006 Winners

[7] New Page 1

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[9] YouTube - HEAD CASE - World Premiere on 'The Midnight Ride' (3 of 3)

title: Benjamin P. Ablao Jr.

question: What argument could be offered that Benjamin P Ablao Jr may have planned a future away from the performing arts when leaving school?

answer: He enrolled at the University of Delaware as an International Relations major and continued his education there until he transferred to Widener University in 1997. He obtained his Bachelor of Science degree and Certificate in Paralegal Studies in 2003. He is currently working to obtain his Masters in Business Administration from the University of Phoenix-Philadelphia (PA) campus.

critique: The answer does not mention that he worked in a financial services company.

critique: The answer does not mention his work in journalism.

question: How did Ablao eventually get into movies?

answer: While in a financial services company Ablao worked on some film clips, these developed into a strong business relationship and personal friendship with the director, Anthony Spadaccini.

critique: Instead of listing the history of Ablao, this should be specified as the way Ablao got into film.

critique: The answer should make it clear that Ablao works on films, not clips.

critique: The answer should mention that Ablao eventually became a producer.

critique: The answer does not mention that Ablao eventually became a producer.

question: How did Ablao meet his wife?

answer: Not answered.

critique: The question is not answered in the text.


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The days are getting longer. The sun, hanging lower in the sky. Soon enough, you’re going to find yourself in the midst of another polar vortex, covering each and every square inch of skin in a desperate attempt to keep the cold air from freezing you to your very core. Before that happens, though, it’s important that you do all that is necessary to prep for the frigid weather to come—by switching out your normal grooming products for their winter-ready counterparts.

Like squirrels need to gather nuts and bears need to eat a whole bunch of stuff, or whatever, you need to revamp your product choices before your skin can comfortably hibernate through the long, cold depths of winter. (Unless, of course, you want it to look like a dry, chapped mess when it reemerges come April. In which case, by all means keep using what you’re using.) Likewise, we’ve put together a list of necessary trade-ins you can make now, before the weather really gets real and it’s too late.

_Clinique for Men Maximum Hydrator, $34, macys.com_

TURN YOUR MOISTURIZER UP TO 11

You’re already using a moisturizer, right? Good. Unfortunately, though, with whipping winds, frigid air and “wintry mix” turning the world around you into a veritable tundra for the next few months, irritating your skin exponentially more than normal, ordinary lotion simply isn’t going to cut it. Bummer. Luckily, there’s stronger stuff out there. Formulated with the most oomph per ounce, Clinique for Men Maximum Hydrator guarantees to sooth skin even in the most brutal conditions.

_Kiehls Ultimate Man Body Scrub, $15, neimanmarcus.com_

EXFOLIATE AWAY THE ITCH

Have you ever noticed that the colder it gets, the more you find yourself scratching? Well, that’s not the wool sweater you’re wearing. No, it’s actually more likely due to things like central heat, which suck moisture out of the air, leaving your skin parched in the process. Quell the resulting itchiness by swapping out your normal bar soap for one with a heavy-duty exfoliator. Besides, well, scratching the itch, it’ll get rid of dead cells and increase blood flow to the skin, encouraging the body to repair the damage.

_Aesop Elemental Facial Barrier Cream, $60, aesop.com_

UPGRADE YOUR FACE DEFENSE

Ordinarily, as long as you’re following general skin care rules, you don’t much extra for your face to look its best. But winter isn’t ordinary, and with your face being the one swath of skin truly exposed all day, you’re going to need more than just genetics and a touch of moisturizer to keep to it up. Aesop’s Elemental Barrier Cream should do the trick; it’s designed to provide your visage with a blockade against difficult weather, so you don’t immediately look a mess everytime you walk outside.

_Ernest Supplies Lip Protect, $7, ernestsupplies.com_

NEVER FORGET YOUR LIP BALM

While we’re on the topic of your face, let’s focus in a bit on one part in particular: your lips. Turns out, they’ve got some of the thinnest skin on your entire body, so it’s important to keep them protected if you don’t want them cracked and painful all season long. The trouble is, if you’re anything like us, losing lip balms is basically a pastime. Which is exactly why Ernest Supplies has a monthly subscription option for their products. So that next time you lose a tube of Lip Protect, you can rest easy knowing that another is on it’s way.

_Anthony Facial Moisturizer Broad Spectrum Sunscreen, $33, dermstore.com_

KEEP UP THE SPF

Just because you’re not going to be lounging on the beach for the next few months, doesn’t mean than you can let your guard down when it comes to UV-protection. This is especially true in particularly snowy locales, as any skier will tell you, as the sun’s rays have a tendency bounce off brilliant white snow and give you a hearty mid-winter sunburn. Make sure that doesn’t happen by putting a little SPF into everything you use.

Actually, that’s a good rule year-round.

question: Summarize what the text states about the need for having a good moisturizer.

answer: A lot of us find ourselves the victims of tree pollen, pollution, dust, and other forms of irritants. Wintertime, however, usually means having to drive into the whipping winds and frigid air, letting your hydration slide back to well below normal because it appears that your body gets accustomed to it the more the cold weather worsens. Throw in ice cold climates, things are not going to get any better. Always check out your moisturizer. It should really be up to the challenge! Bring on the strong and heavy-duty moisturizer before winter hits, and keep on going.

critique: The answer is not relevant to the question.

critique: This answer is not related to the question.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The response contains inaccurate information.

question: Summarize how the text advertises the Kiehls Ultimate Man Body Scrub.

answer: The text advertises the Kiehls Ultimate Man Body Scrub by saying it will help with the itching brought on by the dry skin caused by the cold, harsh winter. The Kiehls Ultimate Man Body Scrub is a body scrub that exfoliates dead cells and increases blood flow to the skin. The text also says that the Kiehls Ultimate Man Body Scrub will get rid of dead cells and increase blood flow to the skin, encouraging the body to repair the damage.

critique: The text does not say that the Kiehls Ultimate Man Body Scrub will get rid of dead cells and increase blood flow to the skin, encouraging the body to repair the damage.

question: Summarize how the text advertises the use of SPF in the winter time.

answer: The text uses the example of the sun bouncing off snow in the winter time to justify the need to use SPF in the winter. The sun's rays, even in the winter, can still give a person a hearty mid-winter sunburn, no matter the season. The text says that this is especially true in places where it snows a lot and there is a lot of snow on the ground.

critique: The text does not say that the sun's rays, even in the winter, can still give a person a hearty mid-winter sunburn, no matter the season. The text says that this is especially true in places where it snows a lot and there is a lot of snow on the ground.

question: Which of the items advertised in this text seem to be the most popular and the ones that generates the most sales?

answer: The text doesn't mention which of the items advertised are the most popular and the ones that generates the most sales.

critique: The text mentions that Ultimate man body scrub is the "number one pick for exfoliating". It also mentions that The Whitening Company has the best new light mask and the Kiehls Ultimate man body scrub is the "number one pick for exfoliating".

critique: The answer is incorrect. The text mentions the items that are the most popular and the ones that generate the most sales.

critique: The question is asking for an inference.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The text mentions that the items are the most popular and the ones that generates the most sales.

critique: The text does mention the most popular items.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The text mentions the most popular items.

critique: The answer is wrong. The text mentions a specific product, which is the Lip Protect, as the one that generates the most sales.


text:
I've been a long time lurker but haven't made an account until now. I got bored over Spring Break and wrote this, feedback is appreciated.

*Michael*

“Turn right on East 42nd Street.”

“Yeah, yeah, I got it.” Michael Dunham had moved about a month ago, but he still wasn’t comfortable driving without a GPS. He took a right turn as instructed, the fire department building coming into sight. Michael let out a small sigh before pulling in and climbing out of his car. He felt too tired to work, but that was the problem with being a firefighter- one minute you’re relaxing, the next you’re sliding down a pole and speeding off to some emergency. Michael just hoped he wouldn’t be called in too early.

“Hey, Mike,” greeted his friend Andrew. He was a pretty friendly person in Michael’s opinion, but he never spent enough time with him to know anything about the man. “You feeling okay? You don’t look so great.”

“Huh? Yeah, I’m fine. Just… fine…” Michael trailed off. He was doing everything he could not to fall asleep standing up. He couldn’t figure out why he was so tired. He’d gone to bed early, woke up at a reasonable hour… maybe it was that cold that was going around. Regardless, Michael slowly treaded through the department and upstairs, to the beds. Plopping down onto his own, he closed his eyes for a moment. Still, he knew that he had to be prepared for anything, so he took a few minutes to change into his uniform and set his equipment beside the bed. As soon as he lay back down, however, he was fast asleep.

Michael awoke to the sound of a blaring siren and shuffling feet. He felt somewhat well rested, but remained hazy and groggy. He grabbed his gear, stomping along with the rest of the men. He grabbed the fire pole with both hands, quickly sliding down. Seeing Andrew behind the wheel of a truck, he ran to the passenger side and leapt in. “We got a Class A fire at some Cul-De-Sac on Lincoln Avenue,” said Andrew. Class A meant a standard fire from wood, paper, fabric or plastic. Someone might have knocked over a candle or something, but it shouldn’t be too bad.

As they drove, some other information came from the radio. The fire didn’t sound very dangerous, until Michael heard that the family was trapped inside. Some of the ceiling had collapsed due to years of unknown wear, and the main door was blocked. Even worse, the home had those old picture windows, the ones that didn’t open. As the truck eventually pulled up to the home, Andrew ran out and attached a fire hose to a nearby hydrant, beginning to spray down the fire. Michael was preparing to run in and save the family, when he noticed an empty gas can near a vehicle on the house’s driveway. The contents of the can had spilled all over the ground. “Wait!” yelled Michael.

“What is it Mike, we don’t have time for this!” replied Andrew.

“There’s an open gas can, this isn’t a Class A fire!” screamed Michael.

Andrew had a look of horror on his face. He turned to the other firefighters, relaying this information. Michael knew what this all meant. With things like gasoline and liquid fires, spraying it with water only causes the fuel to scatter and spread flames. Now Michael really had to get in and help those people. He strapped on his SCBA (gasmask), grabbed his fire axe, and sprinted into the home. He quickly navigated through the rubble, listening for any coughing or yelling. “Help!” screamed a young woman, her leg trapped by a large wooden plank. Michael knelt down, grabbing the plank with both arms and lifting. It began to rise, but then the wave of tiredness struck Michael again. He couldn’t find the strength to pull the plank off. He tried over and over again, but was startled by a large rumbling from the roof. He looked up to see something falling, and before he could act he completely blacked out.

“Mike… hey, Mike?”

“Michael! Wake up!”

“Mike! Come on, man!”

“I’m up, I’m up,” Michael coughed.

“Hey, man… you survived.” Andrew said to Michael, giving him a pat on the back.

“The… family?” asked Michael.

Andrew just gave him a frown. “They, uh… We were able to get you out, but the girl had been crushed. The rest of the family couldn’t get out before a whole section of the house collapsed.”

Michael stayed silent, but he began to sob.

PATIENT NOTES

MICHAEL JAMES DUNHAM

GENDER: Male

AGE: 31

HEIGHT: 5’10

WEIGHT: 183 lb.

STATUS: Mentally Unstable

Michael is a firefighter who was injured on-duty. He attempted to save a trapped woman whose leg was caught. He was then sent unconscious as some falling rubble hit him and the woman. Michael was saved but the girl and family inside the house were not.

Michael has become a very silent and reserved person, only speaking when I initiate conversation. He is shortening his sentences to only say what needs to be stated. He does not appear to be showering, shaving, or showing any regard for his own personal hygiene.

Michael has shown signs of extreme depression and thoughts of suicide. He continues to tell me that if he is ever going to end his own life, he is going to jump off his own fire department’s building. I have prescribed anti-depressant medication, but it seems to be having no effect.
In short, it would be advised to keep an eye on Michael, especially late at night, when it seems his suicidal tendencies spike. Do not let him operate vehicles or machinery after 10 P.M. unless it is a critical emergency.

-Dr. Ethan McCreary

Michael slowly climbed out of bed, looking at the clock. 11:30 P.M, it read. He remained silent, sauntering out of his bedroom. He moved to the front door, grabbing his car keys and stepping outside. Getting into his vehicle, he turned on the GPS and began speeding off.

“Turn right on East 42nd Street.”

title: [RF] Michael

question: What does the story say about Class B fires?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that Class B fires are fires that involve flammable liquids.

critique: The answer should mention that Class B fires are more dangerous than Class A fires.

question: What does the story say about how Michael was feeling the day they responded to the fire on Lincoln Avenue?

answer: Michael was feeling very tired. He had gone to bed early, woke up at a reasonable hour, and was still feeling tired. He wasn't sure why he was so tired but thought it was probably because of the cold. Regardless, he was very tired and couldn't find the strength to pull the plank off the trapped woman whose leg was caught. He felt like he couldn't save the trapped woman and the rest of the family.

critique: The answer should mention his suicidal tendencies.

critique: The passage does not state that Michael thought he couldn't save the trapped woman and the rest of the family. This is made up. It also includes irrelevant details.

critique: The answer omits the part where Michael is overcome by tiredness again while trying to save the trapped woman.

critique: The answer omits the part where Michael shows signs of depression and thoughts of suicide.

question: What does the story say about the fire Michael and the other firefighters responded to?

answer: Michael and the other firefighters responded to a Class A fire at a Cul-De-Sac on Lincoln Avenue. The family was trapped inside. Some of the ceiling had collapsed due to years of unknown wear, and the main door was blocked. The home had old picture windows that didn't open. Michael noticed an empty gas can near a vehicle on the house's driveway. The contents of the can had spilled all over the ground. Michael warned his fellow firefighters that the fire wasn't a Class A fire because of the open gas can. The firefighters had to spray down the fire with water, which only causes the fuel to scatter and spread flames. Michael had to get in and help those people. He was able to save the trapped woman whose leg was caught but the girl and family inside the house were not. Michael became a very silent and reserved person, only speaking when the doctor initiated conversation. He is shortening his sentences to only say what needs to be stated. He does not appear to be showering, shaving, or showing any regard for his own personal hygiene. Michael has shown signs of extreme depression and thoughts of suicide. He continues to tell the doctor that if he is ever going to end his own life, he is going to jump off his own fire department's building. The doctor prescribed anti-depressant medication, but it seems to be having no effect. In short, it would be advised to keep an eye on Michael, especially late at night, when it seems his suicidal tendencies spike.

critique: The answer is a summary of the entire story. It should be more specific about the fire Michael and the other firefighters responded to.

critique: The response is almost entirely irrelevant.

critique: The highlighted text is irrelevant to the question.

critique: Most of the response is about Michael and can be omitted.

critique: The answer is a summary of the entire story, not just the fire.

text: Everything about how Michael feels after the fire is irrelevant and should be omitted.

category: coherence

question: What does the story say about Michael's condition after the fire?

answer: Michael is now on anti-depressant medication but his suicidal tendencies spike, especially at night. He is prescribed to not drive after 10 PM, except in grave emergencies, until midnight.

critique: The answer should mention his mental instability.

critique: The part about Michael driving after 10 pm is unattested.

critique: The answer should mention that Michael is also mentally unstable.

critique: It is omitted that he is mentally unstable.

critique: The answer omits that Michael is showing signs of extreme depression.

critique: The answer should mention that Michael is depressed about the loss of the family.

critique: The answer doesn't recognize that it's specifically late at night that Michael's suicidal tendencies spike.


text:
GEORGE FREDERICK CHARLES, MARGRAVE OF BRANDENBURG-BAYREUTH (19 June 1688 at Obersulzbürg Castle, near Mühlhausen – 17 May 1735 in Bayreuth), was a German prince, member of the House of Hohenzollern, nominal Margrave of Brandenburg-Bayreuth-Kulmbach (1708–35) and Margrave of Brandenburg-Bayreuth (1726–35).

Family

He was the eldest of the fourteen children born to Margrave Christian Heinrich of Brandenburg-Bayreuth-Kulmbach by his wife, Countess Sophie Christiane of Wolfstein. Besides him, only six of his siblings survived childhood: Albrecht Wolfgang, killed in battle in 1734; Dorothea Charlotte, Countess of Hohenlohe-Weikersheim, who died in 1712 after only seven months of marriage; Sophie Magdalene, Queen of Denmark; Frederick Ernst; Sophie Caroline, Princess of Ostfriesland; and Frederick Christian, who later inherited the margraviate of Bayreuth.

Life

During his early years, George Frederick Charles was instructed by his very religious mother, and later received a careful formal education in Bielefeld. From 1700 to 1704 he travelled to western Europe as part of a traditional educational journey (Grand Tour), and visited, among other countries, Denmark, France and the Dutch Republic. Later, he studied four years at the University of Utrecht. After the death of his father in 1708 he returned with his family, who had lived since 1704 in the Schloss Weferlingen near Magdeburg, and assumed the nominal title of _Margrave of Brandenburg-Bayreuth-Kulmbach_.

Schloss Weferlingen had been assigned to his family as an appanage by King Frederick I of Prussia, after George Frederick Charles's heavily indebted father had renounced his succession rights to the Franconian Hohenzollern estates of Bayreuth and Ansbach in favour of Prussia in the Contract of Schönberg. George Frederick Charles nonetheless tried to recover his rights after the death of his father and sought the abolition of this contract. He was able to secure the support of the Franconian states, who feared being merged into the Franconian Circle by Prussia. George Frederick Charles could also rely on the decisive assistance of the Archbishop of Mainz and Prince-Bishop of Bamberger Lothar Franz von Schönborn and his nephew, the Imperial Vice-Chancellor (German: _Reichsvizekanzler_) Frederick Karl von Schönborn, who supported the abolition of the Contract of Schönberg. His efforts finally succeeded only in 1722 after long and difficult discussions and the payment of a substantial indemnity to Prussia.

When the Margrave Georg Wilhelm died in 1726 without surviving male issue, George Frederick Charles assumed the principality of Bayreuth without further difficulties.

After his accession, George Frederick Charles put great value on the improvement of the ruined finances of his territories and made local government his highest priority. In contrast to many of his contemporary rulers, he had no political or military ambitions. Instead he was very pious and intensely supported August Hermann Francke in inculcating the importance of religious life for his subjects. He was remarkable for his support of orphanages.

He was uninterested in court life, and in his last years built up Schloss Himmelkron, a former monastery, probably with plans to retire there.

In the memoirs of his daughter-in-law Wilhelmine of Prussia, George Frederick Charles is described as a thin, bandy-legged, egotistical, wrong-headed, jealous person. The antipathy was mutual. The margrave harassed his daughter-in-law in much the same way that her parents had done. When Wilhelmine gave birth to a daughter, it destroyed George Frederick Karl's hopes to take charge of his grandchild's upbringing, since he was allowed to supervise the education of his son Frederick's child only if it were a boy, according to the marriage contract signed with Wilhelmine. Frederick supported his wife and the drunk margrave hit him with his stick without injuring him.

Marriage and issue

In Reinfeld on 17 April 1709 George Frederick Charles married Dorothea of Schleswig-Holstein-Sonderburg-Beck. They had five children:

1.  Sophie Christiane Luise (b. Weferlingen, 4 January 1710 – d. Brussels, 13 June 1739), married on 11 April 1731 to Alexander Ferdinand, 3rd Prince of Thurn and Taxis.
2.  Frederick (b. Weferlingen, 10 May 1711 – d. Bayreuth, 26 February 1763), successor of his father as Margrave of Bayreuth.
3.  Wilhelm Ernst (b. Weferlingen, 26 July 1712 – d. Mantua, 7 November 1733).
4.  Sophie Charlotte Albertine (b. Weferlingen, 27 July 1713 – d. Ilmenau, 2 March 1747), married on 7 April 1734 to Duke Ernst August I of Saxe-Weimar.
5.  Sophie Wilhelmine (b. Weferlingen, 8 July 1714 – d. Aurich, 7 September 1749), married on 25 May 1734 to Prince Charles Edzard of East Frisia.

After seven years of unhappy marriage, George Frederick Charles and Dorothea separated in 1716. Eight years later (1724), their marriage was formally dissolved. Dorothea later emigrated to Sweden, where she died in 1761, twenty years after her former husband. Neither of them remarried.

Ancestry

title: George Frederick Charles, Margrave of Brandenburg-Bayreuth

question: Summarize everything relating to the deaths of Charles's family members.

answer: His father died in 1708, his sister Dorothea Charlotte died in 1712, his sister Sophie Caroline died in 1747, his sister Sophie Wilhelmine died in 1749, and his son Frederick died in 1763.

critique: The response doesn't mention his other siblings.

critique: The response is missing the deaths of his siblings Albrecht Wolfgang and Frederick Ernst.

critique: The answer omits the deaths of his siblings Albrecht Wolfgang and Frederick Ernst.

critique: His sister Dorothea Charlotte's death is incorrect.

critique: His sister Dorothea Charlotte died in 1712, his sister Sophie Caroline died in 1747, his sister Sophie Wilhelmine died in 1749, and his son Frederick died in 1763.

critique: His son Frederick probably died before 1763, so that is premature.

question: What does the article say about the type of person George Frederick Charles was?

answer: He was a German prince, a member of the House of Hohenzollern, and nominal Margrave of Brandenburg-Bayreuth. He was brought up by his very religious mother and received a formal education. His father renounced his succession rights to the Franconian Hohenzollern estates of Bayreuth and Ansbach in favor of Prussia in the Contract of Schönberg. However, he tried to recover his rights, which required much discussion and the payment of a substantial indemnity to Prussia. He was a pious man and supported orphanages, and he was an uninterested courtier.

critique: The answer omits that he was a jealous person.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The response should include that he was described as a thin, bandy-legged, egotistical, wrong-headed, jealous person.

critique: This is a summary of the article, not a description of the type of person George Frederick Charles was.

critique: The response includes extraneous information that is not useful for the task.

critique: It's omitted that he was an egotistical and jealous person.

question: What does the article say about Charles's life during the first decade of the 1700s?

answer: He was instructed by his very religious mother and received a careful formal education in Bielefeld. He travelled to western Europe as part of a traditional educational journey and visited, among other countries, Denmark, France, and the Dutch Republic. He studied four years at the University of Utrecht. After the death of his father in 1708, he returned with his family to assume the nominal title of Margrave of Brandenburg-Bayreuth-Kulmbach.

critique: It's omitted that Charles married in 1709 and had five children.

critique: "After the death of his father in 1708, he returned with his family to assume the nominal title of Margrave of Brandenburg-Bayreuth-Kulmbach." - this is irrelevant and should be deleted.

critique: The answer could mention his marriage in 1709.

critique: He was instructed by his mother in his early years, not during the first decade of the 1700s.

critique: It is omitted that he married in 1709 and had his first child in 1710.

question: What does the article say about Charles's relationship with his son-in-law?

answer: Charles was uninterested in court life. He built up Schloss Himmelkron with plans to retire there. In the memoirs of his daughter-in-law, Charles is described as an egotistical, wrong-headed, jealous person. Charles harassed his daughter-in-law much like her parents had done. When Wilhelmine gave birth to a daughter, it destroyed Charles' hopes to take charge of his grandchild's upbringing. Charles was allowed to supervise the education of his son Frederick's child only if it were a boy, according to the marriage contract signed with Wilhelmine. Frederick supported his wife and the drunk margrave hit him with his stick.

critique: The information about Charles building up Schloss Himmelkron is irrelevant to the question.

critique: This is irrelevant to describe how Charles' and his son-in-law's relationship functioned.

text: Charles has no son in law

category: accuracy


text:
The cabin had a musty, unused smell to it. It had been a couple of years since anyone had been here, so he went around and opened up all the doors and windows and just let the wind carry out the emptiness while he swept and dusted. It wasn’t too long, though, before he heard a car door out front.
“Who could that be?” he thought. His wife and son weren’t due until tomorrow. Jenny and her family weren’t supposed to be there until the day after. Puzzled, he frowned to himself before going to check, but he stopped and smiled again as soon as he turned around. There, leaning against the doorpost, was Jenny, looking the same as she always did with her long red hair hanging down her back, blue eyes, and a gentle, soft smile on her lips.
“Hey,” he said quietly. She walked toward him and said, “Hey,” before giving him a hug. They parted and he shook his head, marveling at the fact that although it had been almost two years since they had seen each other, there was no unfamiliarity there, no sense of distance grown as often happens. “I thought you weren’t coming until tomorrow night,” he said. “I decided to come early to air the place out.” She looked around the cabin and smiled at him. “Looks like you beat me to it.”
The day finished with them cleaning out the cabin, top to bottom. As often happens when two old friends find themselves doing some menial chores together, they wound up spending most of the time laughing at each other. Old jokes, new jokes, stories about people they knew now, and tales about people they knew back in the day. Just… enjoying the company of a person they didn’t have to hide anything from and have no reason to impress. As the afternoon came and went, and the evening turned to dusk, they cracked open the beer he’d brought and sat down on the porch to watch the sun sink behind the trees. A quiet peace drifted over them in the stillness of an evening free of demand.
Night fell and they decided to go inside and light a lamp or two so they could spend the rest of the evening playing cards at the kitchen table, they way they used to. As they sat and played, a peaceful quiet lingered with them and they didn’t disturb it with unnecessary chatter. After all, why should two people who know each other more intimately than most married couples ever do need to speak to feel comfortable around each other? As they sat there in the comfortable quiet, his mind began to drift across his memories, and across to her, thinking about all the things they had shared over almost thirty years of friendship. Growing up together, grade school, her boyfriends, his girlfriends, the breakups and the weddings, all of it touched his mind as they played. He realized, with a small amount of surprise, that almost all of his happy memories were ones he shared with her.
There had never been a relationship between them, never any hint that things should be other than what they were, and though they both acknowledged that it was a bit of an oddity whenever other people pointed it out, they had never thought much of it on their own. He looked over at her, picking up a card from the table, her hair and face glowing in the soft, yellow lamplight, and he couldn’t help but think of the only time the idea had presented itself that there could be more to their friendship than simply being friends.
They had gone camping, just the two of them, after her college sweetheart had left her and she wanted to get away, just get away from everything and everyone that reminded her of him. So they went out to the woods and just let it all go. That night, he remembered they had just looked across the fire at each other, her face and hair glowing then so much like they were glowing now, and he had thought to himself that she was beautiful. Not beautiful the way he told other people she was beautiful, but beautiful to him, in a much more personal and intimate way than he had known. He had thought, then, that he might be in love with her, and as she raised her eyes to meet his, he had known that the thought he saw in her eyes, her beautiful blue eyes glowing in the firelight, was the same as his. But the moment passed without record, and soon enough their hearts had gone their separate ways again.
He realized it was his turn to play and looked over at her, at this beautiful, amazing woman he had somehow spent his whole life with, and found her looking at him. A moment passed between them that seemed to last far longer than a heartbeat before her eyes left his again, but that was all it took, just one moment, for both of them to realize. She reached for another card, distractedly, and as she reached for it, he reached for her, and gently, oh so gently, placed his hand on hers. She lifted her gaze to meet his once again, and this time there was no hiding the question in her eyes, the desperate longing needing an answer. A sad smile drew across his face and, heart breaking oh so gently, he shook his head, just a tiny motion back and forth. His hand left hers, and she drew her card.
They played into the night, still holding onto that quiet comfort, but he wondered now if his life would feel the same to him, now that it had been acknowledged. It seemed a lonely life, knowing that the woman you had married wasn’t the one you should have, that the one you loved wasn’t the one waiting at home for you.
They finished their game and said goodnight. He changed out of his clothes and into his pajamas, and lay down in bed before he let it take him. They knew, both of them, that it was too late. It wasn’t a regret, or even a chance untaken. It was just a choice they had never made, and nothing more. There was a gentle sadness in him, a vast wondering question in his heart. He closed his eyes and took a deep breath before he heard the door open behind him in the dark. Soft footsteps crossed the floor, and his blanket lifted. Rolling over, he put his arms around her and pulled her close, holding her tightly as tears dropped silently onto his pillow.

title: The Cabin

question: Summarise what the story says about the relationship between Jenny and the protagonist.

answer: Jenny and the protagonist have been friends for thirty years. They've known each other intimately and have been through a lot together. They had a moment of attraction when they were younger, but it was never acted on. They are married to other people now.

critique: The answer should mention the protagonist's feeling for Jenny when they were young.

critique: The answer should mention that the protagonist realizes he loves Jenny.

critique: The answer should mention that they are married to other people, but that they are not in love with their spouses.

text: Add that they might still be in love with each other, but it's too late.


text:
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So you've decided to purchase one of our TMTS devices, what now? First you'll need to open this envelope, and retrieve your QVM prescription. Once you have called the number at the bottom and scheduled your appointment, we move on to step two!

Here at QVM, we pride ourselves on expedient and experienced service. Most applicants will have a two to three week waiting period for appointments. QVM is not liable for expiration before product pick up, or during appointment procedures.

Once you have arrived, one of our many experienced staff will greet you and lead you to an exam room. Here you will go through step three, and receive a thorough physical as well as a round of antibiotics, antivirals, and anesthesia in prep for your procedure.

Before we continue, we would like you to know a few facts about your brain. The most complex part of your body, its processing power has yet to be matched by machine. It is also capable of what some consider a form of precognition, able to estimate and predict outcomes!

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Whether its those forgotten days of youth, or to see yourself finally financially stable in the future, we can send you there!

So you've been prepped for your procedure, what now? First they will stabilize your brain within our patent pending CSG fluid, and begin the process of removing all of your unnecessary organs. As each is removed, it will be set aside, either to be recycled or at your expense, held.

Slowly the surgeon will remove the cranium, and very carefully detach the upper portion of spine removing the brain along with it. Your brain will still be sleeping at this point, and you will be moved into your own private cradle and attached to life support systems. All remaining organs will now be dealt with, and the body will either be disposed of or held, at your cost.

It is at this point that the TMTS device will be grafted onto your memory centers, and upon your "awakening", you will be within your new life, wherever you wanted to be!

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QVM is not liable for any of the following: Incorrect Destination, Non Satisfaction after the fact, Power Surges, Peak Power Days, Any and all symptoms of Fatigue, and/or loss of connection. Not every procedure occurs as depicted, And some destinations cannot be reached. Shifting to destination can only be done once, and in 99% of cases is completely irreversible. If TMTS device is found faulty a manufacturers refund can be issued.

title: [SF] A Bright Future, Today!

question: What is the ultimate destination of the person who purchases a TMT device?

answer: Success.

critique: The destination is whichever destination the customer wants.

critique: "Success" can't be the destination. It's unclear.

critique: The ultimate destination is not success. It is the person's own paradise.

critique: No, one can reach their desired destination.

critique: It is not stated, but it is implied that the destination is perfection.

critique: "Success" is not a destination, but a quality of life.

critique: The first two sentences of the passage support this answer but the third sentence says that the ultimate destination can only be reached once and is irreversible.

critique: The answer is not mentioned in the passage.

critique: Unclear from the text that he will be successful as a result of buying the device.

critique: The answer is not stated in the passage.

text: The answer should mention that the destination can be anywhere along the person's own timeline--in their past or their future.

refinement: Success.

question: What happens to the body?

answer: Its unnecessary organs are removed and it is set aside, either for recycling or for storage. The brain is detached and placed on life support. Then a TMTS device is grafted onto the memory centers.

critique: More details about the removal of organs

critique: We are not told what happens to the body.

critique: The body is disposed of or held at the cost of the customer.

critique: The answer should mention that the body is disposed of or stored.

critique: The answer is irrelevant to the question.

critique: The brain is removed and a TMTS is grafted to the memory centers

critique: It misses to mention that the body is disposed of.

critique: The body is disposed of or held at the cost of the buyer

critique: The body is disposed of or stored at the customer's cost

critique: The body is disposed of or held at the expense of the buyer.

critique: The body is disposed of or stored at the customer's expense.

critique: The answer should mention that the body is disposed of.

critique: This is a statement of what happens AFTER a person already has the TMTS device

question: Why is the body removed?

answer: What is the purpose of removing the brain?

critique: So it's not exactly the purpose; it shows how the TMTS device works

critique: The question is not asking why the body is removed.

critique: The purpose of the brain is not to be removed.

critique: The purpose of removing the brain is to implant the device.

critique: The answer is not relevant to the question.

critique: Who are you to question why someone would remove the brain

critique: The answer does not explain why the body is removed.

question: How does QVM profit from this?

answer: By selling the receipient products and products made by said devices.

critique: It is possible for there to be a miscommunication based on the input

critique: It is omitted that the brain is the best computing system ever created, and within your paradise, you'll only be using 10%-17% of its full power.

critique: "By selling the receipient products and products made by said devices." - the answer is randomly and irrelevant.

critique: The text does not say that QVM is selling the recipient of the TMTS device any products.

critique: They sell the device, not the receipient products

critique: It may be implied that QVM profits from the use of the brain, because it is a complex computing system that requires little power.

critique: Improve grammar, 'sells' instead of 'sells'

critique: It is important to note that the TMTS device is for sale, but the profit is made from the fact that the user's brain is used to power other devices.

critique: "By selling the receipient products and products made by said devices." - this isn't directly stated in the passage.

critique: The second part of the answer is irrelevant.


text:
_PIRANHA HEIGHTS_ is a one act play by Philip Ridley. It is Ridley's seventh stage play for adults and premiered at the Soho Theatre, London in 2008.[1] The production was the second collaboration between Ridley and Soho Theatre Artistic Director Lisa Goldman whom Ridley dedicated the play to in his preface of the published text. The play also featured Luke Treadaway in one of his earliest professional stage credits, who along with actor John Macmillan was filmed for Ridley's 2009 horror film _Heartless_, during the play's original run.[2][3][4]

_Piranha Heights_ serves as the third and final instalment in Ridley's unofficially titled “Brothers Trilogy”, having been preceded by _Mercury Fur_ and _Leaves of Glass_.[5][6][7]

The play was later revived at The Old Red Lion Theatre in 2014 for which Ridley substantially revised the script.[8]

Plot

The play takes place on Mother's Day where Alan is in his mother's flat. Unexpectedly his brother Terry turns up, having been missing since after their Mother's death several weeks before.

Terry has brought along with him a fifteen-year-old girl called Lilly who lives in a squat below the flat. She wears a hijab with niqab, speaks in an unusual mix of English and an unknown Middle-Eastern language and also claims to have endured many horrors as a victim of an Islamic war in an unspecified country.

Tension mounts while the anger builds between the two brothers as they argue over who should inherit the flat, as well as argue their conflicting memories of their deceased mother.

Eventually Lilly's partner The Medic arrives. He is a sixteen-year-old boy who frequently swings from being overly grateful to extremely angry. He along with Lilly look after a plastic baby doll called Bubba which they treat as if it is their own child.

Also showing up at the flat unexpectedly is Alan's 15-year-old son Garth, who for years has hidden his true psychotic personality, enjoying to inflict cruelty onto others under the influence of his imaginary friend called Mr Green.

Taking place in real-time and spanning approximately ninety minutes in length, chaos ensues in the flat as the characters go to extreme lengths to achieve their aims.

Notable Productions

PREMIERE

15 May 2008 at the Soho Theatre, London.
Directed by Lisa Goldman.

-   Alan - Nicolas Tennant
-   Terry - Matthew Wait
-   Lilly - Jade Williams
-   Medic - John Macmillan
-   Garth - Luke Treadaway

Shortlisted for _The MOBIUS Best Off-West End Production_ Award at the 2009 WhatsOnStage.com Theatregoers Choice Awards[9]

2014 REVIVAL

11 November 2014 at the Old Red Lion Theatre, London.
Directed by Max Barton.

-   Alan - Alex Lowe
-   Terry - Phil Cheadle
-   Lilly - Rebecca Boey
-   Medic - Ryan Gerald
-   Garth - Jassa Ahluwalia

Reception

The original production received generally positive reviews.

Michael Coveney of _WhatsOnStage.com_ gave an enthusiastic review, awarding the play five stars, writing that “With this truly remarkable new play, Philip Ridley completes an East End trilogy of siblings and apocalypse – the others were _Mercury Fur_ and _Leaves of Glass_ – that will one day be rated one of the high water marks of British drama in the first decade of this century” adding that the production was “a work of dark fantasy and genius.”[10] Philip Fisher of _British Theatre Guide_ gave a positive review, stating that the play “is the theatrical equivalent of a gigantic Jackson Pollock splatter painting. It is shocking with little surface meaning but is addictive and, to some, inexplicably attractive.”[11] Aleks Sierz for _The Stage_ praised the play, writing that “although the imaginary element of the play is often outrageously cruel and breathtakingly audacious, it is always firmly grounded in the emotional truth of character” and that “it really feels as if Ridley has single-handedly brought white-knuckle excitement and appalling truth back to the new [play]writing scene.”[12]

_The Guardian_ critic Lyn Gardner, though giving a mostly positive review, only awarded the play three stars, saying that it is “not a show for everyone and definitely not for the faint-hearted.”[13] _Time Out London_ gave a mostly positive review remarking that “there is some fine writing here, combined with moments of knuckle-whitening tension” and that the play “evokes the all too recognisable violence and madness of modern Britain.” However, the magazine criticised elements of Ridley's writing, saying that the “script never quite decides whether it's a farce or magical realism” and also added that “[it is] a bit of a mess structurally – as if three separate plays are fighting for attention.”[14]

On seeing the original production actor Ben Whishaw, who had starred in two of Ridley's previous adult plays (_Mercury Fur_ and _Leaves of Glass_), remarked that It was “extraordinary and very moving. It put me in a kind of trance. I love the way he [Philip Ridley] writes about fantasy, truth, honesty and lies with such courage, passion, humour and poetry. I think he's a true original”[15]

However, the play was not greeted with praise from all reviewers. Ian Shuttleworth in his prompt corner column for _Theatre Record_ took a dislike to Ridley's use of Lilly's character speaking most of the play in a made-up Middle-Eastern type language, stating that “a character spouting vaguely Middle-Eastern gibberish which is meant to be Arabic prayer is going to be seen with some justification as insulting – not because we're living in sensitive times and need to be politically correct or whatever, but simply because it has all the unsubtlety and laziness of those 1970s TV sitcoms where Europeans or Mexicans were inherently funny simply because they sounded different, and any stereotypical different sounds would do.” He, however, wrote, explaining that he understood that the “character has a point inside the play” but stated that the character “has implications beyond [outside the play’s context]; and I think it's too easy to give the writer a free pass because of claims that he's being bold or challenging” adding that “often [Ridley] doesn't know when to stop.”[16]

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[2] Luke Treadaway's CV on Hamilton Hoddell's website

[3] John Macmillan's CV on Curtis Brown's website

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[8] Webpage of the revised play-text of _Piranha Heights_ on Bloomsbury Publishing's website

[9] Webpage of the 2009 WhatsOnStage Theatre Awards

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[14] webpage of the 2008 production of _Piranha Heights_ on Time Out London's website

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[16] Ian Shuttleworth's Prompt Corner review on his website for the 11/2008 issue of _Theatre Record_

title: Piranha Heights

question: What does the text say about Piranhas?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the play is not about piranhas.

question: What does the text say about Piranha Heights?

answer: Piranha Heights is a one-act play by Philip Ridley. It premiered at the Soho Theatre in London in 2008. It is Ridley's seventh stage play for adults. The play was later revived at the Old Red Lion Theatre in 2014.

critique: The answer should mention the plot of the play.

question: Summarize the plot of Piranha Heights.

answer: Piranha Heights is a one-act play by Philip Ridley. It is the third and final installment in Ridley's "Brothers Trilogy." It takes place on Mother's Day, where Alan is in his mother's flat. His brother Terry, who has been missing since their mother's death several weeks before, arrives with a fifteen-year-old girl named Lilly. Lilly wears a hijab and niqab, speaks in an unusual mix of English and an unknown Middle-Eastern language, and claims to have endured many horrors as a victim of an Islamic war in an unspecified country. Tension mounts between the two brothers as they argue over who should inherit the flat, as well as argue their conflicting memories of their deceased mother. Eventually Lilly's partner The Medic arrives. He is a sixteen-year-old boy who frequently swings from being overly grateful to extremely angry. He and Lilly look after a plastic baby doll they treat as their own child. Alan's 15-year-old son Garth, who has hidden his true psychotic personality, arrives with his imaginary friend, Mr. Green. Chaos ensues in the flat as the characters go to extreme lengths to achieve their aims.

critique: The plot is summarized in a way that is confusing and hard to read.

critique: Add that Lilly's partner, The Medic, is 16 years old.

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critique: "Alan's 15-year-old son Garth, who has hidden his true psychotic personality, arrives with his imaginary friend, Mr. Green. Chaos ensues in the flat as the characters go to extreme lengths to achieve their aims." - this section is irrelevant and can be deleted.

critique: The answer is a summary of the plot and not just the plot.

critique: There is no mention of Alan's son Garth in the plot.

critique: The plot is summarized in a way that is too long and includes extraneous information.


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The COMMUNITY OF PROTESTANT CHURCHES IN EUROPE (CPCE, also GEKE for _Gemeinschaft Evangelischer Kirchen in Europa_) is a fellowship of over 100 Protestant churches which have signed the Leuenberg Agreement. Together they strive for realizing church fellowship, especially by cooperation in witness and service to the world. Prior to 2003 the CPCE was known as the “Leuenberg Church Fellowship”.

In membership are most Lutheran and Reformed churches in Europe, the United churches that originated from mergers of those churches, and such pre-Reformation churches as the Waldensians. The European Methodist churches joined the CPCE by a common declaration of church fellowship in 1997.

The General Secretary of the CPCE is the Reverend Dr Mario Fischer. The Community's offices are located in Vienna, Austria, and are shared with those of the Evangelical Church of the Augsburg Confession in Austria.

History

In 1973, major European Lutheran and Reformed churches met at the Swiss conference centre Leuenberg (near Basel) and signed the LEUENBERG AGREEMENT or LEUENBERG CONCORD, an ecumenical document declaring unity through Jesus Christ.[1] Under this agreement the churches agree on a common understanding of the Gospel, including elementary agreement on important doctrines including christology,[2] predestination,[3] Eucharist[4] and justification.[5] They declare church fellowship, understood as pulpit and table fellowship as well as full communion in witness and service.

The churches involved were originally joined in an organization called the “Leuenberg Church Fellowship”. In 2003 this was renamed the “Community of Protestant Churches in Europe” as a sign of growing beyond the Lutheran and Reformed traditions,[6] and now includes several Methodist churches. Since then, the CPEC has started ecumenical dialogue with Anglican,[7] Baptist,[8] and Orthodox[9] churches.

In 2006, the CPCE published a statute of church constitution,[10] and in 2011 published new guidelines for churches wishing to join.[11] This declaration made clear that “churches wishing to join recognize the ordination and ministry of women ministers in other CPCE churches”.[12]

Member churches

-   Evangelical Church of Augustan Confession in Romania
-   Evangelical Lutheran Church of Romania
-   Evangelical Church of Bremen
-   Federation of Evangelical Lutheran Churches in Switzerland and the Principality of Liechtenstein
-   -   Evangelical Church of Czech Brethren
-   Lutheran Evangelical Church in Italy
-   Waldensian Evangelical Church
-   Methodist Church in Italy
-   Church of Scotland
-   Church of the Brethren in the Czech Republic
-   Czechoslovak Hussite Church
-   Church of Norway
-   Reformed Synod of Denmark
-   Estonian Evangelical Lutheran Church
-   Protestant Church of Augsburg Confession of Alsace and Lorraine
-   United Protestant Church in Belgium
-   Protestant Reformed Church of Alsace and Lorraine
-   United Protestant Church of France
-   Presbyterian Church of Wales
-   -   Evangelical Church of the Augsburg Confession in Slovakia
-   Evangelical Church of the Augsburg Confession in Slovenia
-   Evangelical Church in the Republic of Croatia
-   Evangelical Lutheran Church in Bavaria
-   Evangelical Lutheran Church in Oldenburg
-   Evangelical Lutheran Church in Russia, Ukraine, Kazakhstan and Central Asia
-   Evangelical-Lutheran Church of Hanover
-   Evangelical Lutheran Church in Brunswick
-   Evangelical-Lutheran Church of Saxony
-   Evangelical Lutheran Church of Schaumburg-Lippe
-   Germany Central Conference, United Methodist Church
-   Evangelical Reformed Church in Bavaria and Northwestern Germany
-   Evangelical Church of the Augsburg Confession in Austria
-   Evangelical Church of Anhalt
-   Protestant Church in Baden
-   Evangelical Church in Berlin, Brandenburg and Silesian Upper Lusatia
-   Reformed Church in Austria
-   Evangelical Church in Liechtenstein
-   Evangelical Church of the Palatinate
-   Evangelical Church in the Rhineland
-   Evangelical Church in Germany
-   Protestant Church in Hesse and Nassau
-   Evangelical Church of Hesse Electorate-Waldeck
-   Evangelical Church in Central Germany
-   Evangelical Church of Westphalia
-   Evangelical-Lutheran Church in Württemberg
-   German-Speaking Evangelical-Lutheran Synod in Great Britain
-   Moravian Church
-   Church of Denmark
-   Greek Evangelical Church
-   Waldensian Church of the River Plate
-   Evangelical Church of the River Plate
-   Spanish Evangelical Church
-   United Evangelical Lutheran Church in Argentina
-   Evangelical Methodist Church in Argentina
-   Reformed Church of Argentina
-   -   Evangelical Presbyterian Church of Portugal
-   Reformed Church in Transcarpathia
-   Evangelical Church of the Augsburg Confession in Poland
-   Polish Reformed Church
-   Evangelical Lutheran Church of Latvia
-   Latvian Evangelical Lutheran Church Abroad
-   Lithuanian Evangelical Reformed Church
-   Church of Lippe
-   Evangelical Lutheran Church in Lithuania
-   Lutheran Church in Ireland
-   Evangelical-Lutheran Church in Hungary
-   Reformed Church in Hungary
-   Methodist Church of Great Britain
-   Methodist Church in Ireland
-   Evangelical Lutheran Church in Northern Germany
-   Presbyterian Church in Ireland
-   Protestant Church of Luxembourg
-   Protestant Reformed Church of Luxembourg
-   Protestant Church in the Netherlands
-   Reformed Christian Church in Croatia
-   Reformed Christian Church in Slovakia
-   Remonstrant Brotherhood
-   Reformed Church in Romania
    -   Reformed Diocese of Királyhágómellék
    -   Reformed Diocese of Transylvania
-   Federation of Swiss Protestant Churches
-   Silesian Evangelical Church of the Augsburg Confession
-   Slovak Evangelical Church of the Augsburg Confession in Serbia
-   Reformed Christian Church in Serbia
-   Union of Evangelical Churches
-   United Free Church of Scotland
-   United Methodist Church
-   Central and Southern Europe Central Conference, United Methodist Church
-   Northern Europe Central Conference, United Methodist Church
-   United Reformed Church
-   Conference of Churches on the Rhine
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[2] “Agreement” (1973), §2, 4, 9, 21-23

[3] “Agreement” (1973), §24-25

[4] “Agreement” (1973), §13, 15, 18-20

[5] “Agreement” (1973), §6, 8, 10, 12, 13

[6] , p. 314

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[12] “Guidelines” (2011), §6

question: What does the text say about the Protestant churches are not members of the CPCU?

answer: No answer

critique: The text does not say anything about Protestant churches that are not members of the CPCE.

critique: CPCU stands for Community of Protestant Churches in Europe.


text:
ZUBY NEHTY () are an all-female underground rock group from the Czech Republic.

History

The band formed under the name Plyn in 1980. Plyn played concerts at the 007 Club Strahov, 011 Club Strahov (where they also practised for a while in the mid-to-late 1980s), Euridika, and at alternative rock festivals.[1] After being blacklisted in 1983, they changed their name to Dybbuk and released their first EP on Panton Records[2] in 1986.

In 1987, they changed their name again to Zuby nehty (“Tooth and Nail”). Pavla Jonssonová and Marka Míková started the band with poet Naďa Bilincová. Tomáš Mika and Michal Pokorný joined on saxophones and Jan Lorenc on drums. This formation performed at Slunecnice and Lucerna. Mira Wanek of Už jsme doma proposed in 1991 to produce Dybbuk songs for Punc, and the original lineup (Marka Míková, Kateřina Jirčíková, Pavla Slabá (Jonssonová), Hana Řepová, and Eva Trnková) decided to continue with a new repertoire. The band toured Europe, especially Germany. The first Zuby nehty album _Utíkej_ (Run) came out in 1993, followed by _Král vysílá své vojsko_ (The king sends out his army) in 1995, _Dítkám_ (For the children) in 1997, and _Loď odplouvá_ (The ship is sailing away) in 1999. The band produced a film and several videos for Czech TV, theater soundtracks, and a book of poetry for the underground publishing house Mata.

In 2000, Zuby nehty stopped rehearsing and met occasionally to record soundtracks for Míková's theatrical productions. In 2003, Indies Records released the double CD _Best of ... & Rarity_. The group played on special occasions, e.g. the release of the digitalized film _Hudba Praha 85_ at Archa Theatre, various benefits, and festivals like Mikulov and Unijazz events. In 2010, the decision was made to start rehearsing and playing concerts again. Romek Hanzlik's agency AMP signed the band to regular concerts. The band undertook a US tour in the fall of 2010, including a concert in the annual Czech street festival in New York City on October 2.

In 2014, they released the album _Kusy_ (Pieces).

Zuby nehty has connections with the progressive rock group Už jsme doma: saxophonist Alice Flesarová was once a member of UJD, and UJD's leader Miroslav Wanek produced some of their albums. Pavla Jonssonová has taught and researched gender studies[3] since 1993. Drummer Jana Modráčková went on to play trumpet for Traband and drums for Klec.

Members

Current members

-   Pavla Jonssonová (was Slabá, _née_ Fediuková) – guitar, bass guitar, vocals (1980–1998, 2010–present)
-   Hanka Řepová (_née_ Kubíčková) – drums, vocals (1980–1997, 2010–present)
-   Marka Míková (_née_ Horáková) – keyboard, piano, bass guitar, vocals (1980–2000, 2010–present)
-   Kateřina Jirčíková (_née_ Nejepsová) – alto saxophone, flute, vocals (1983–1988, 1991–1997, 2010–present)

Former members

-   Renata Špičanová – saxophone (1980–1981)
-   Dáša Seidlová – drums (1980–1981)
-   Vendula Kašpárková – keyboard (1981–1983)
-   Eva Trnková – guitar (1985–1988)
-   Naďa Bilincová – guitar (1988–1990)
-   Tomáš Mika – saxophone (1988–1990)
-   Michal Pokorný – saxophone (1988–1990)
-   Jan Lorenc – drums (1988–1990)
-   Michal Lang – drums (1988–1990)
-   Alice Flesarová (_née_ Kalousková) – alto saxophone, vocals (1991–1997)
-   Klára Valentová – violin (1994–1997)
-   Petr Svoboda – drums (1997)
-   Jana Modráčková – drums (1997–2000)
-   Martin Černý – bass guitar (1998–2000)
-   Jaroslav Svoboda – guitar (1998–2000)

Discography

Albums

-   _Ale čert to vem_ (under the name Dybbuk, 1991; re-issued as _Poletíme_ in 1998)
-   _Utíkej_ (1993)
-   _Král vysílá své vojsko_ (1995)
-   _Dítkám_ (1997)
-   _Loď odplouvá_ (1999)
-   _Best of ... & Rarity_ (2003)
-   _Kusy_ (2014)

Compilation appearances

-   _Czech Alternative Music Vol. IV_ (“Ven paca” from _Dítkám_, 1998)
-   _Indies Records 2004 and Best of 15 Years_ (“Kobylka” from _Král vysílá své vojsko_, 2004)

Other

-   _Live 85 Volume 1_ (under the name Plyn/Dybbuk, 1985)
-   _Rock Debut 1_ (under the name Dybbuk, 1986)

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title: Zuby Nehty

question: Summarize the highlights of Zuby Nehty.

answer: In 1980 the band was formed under the name Plyn. They changed their name to Dybbuk in 1983 and then to Zuby Nehty in 1987. The band toured Europe, especially Germany. In 2000, Zuby Nehty stopped rehearsing and met occasionally to record soundtracks for Míková's theatrical productions.

critique: The band's name changes are not the highlights of the band.

text: The response should include the band's albums and music, as well as their reunion in 2010 which culminated in a concert at the annual Czech street festival in New York City.

question: Summarize the band's political leanings and messaging.

answer: No answer

critique: The article mentions the band's name changes and the political climate in which they happened.

critique: The answer should mention that the band's political leanings are not mentioned in the article.

question: Summarize the influence of the band on current alternative music.

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the band is still active.


text:
LUTHERAN SOUTH ACADEMY is a private pre-kindergarten through 12th grade Christian school affiliated with the Lutheran Church–Missouri Synod located in Houston, Texas, United States. It is a member of the Houston Area Independent Schools, a group of roughly 50 private, parochial and independent institutions in the Greater Houston area.

History

In 1949, the Lutheran Education Association of Houston (LEAH) opened its first campus, Lutheran High School, at 6901 Woodridge in Houston, Texas. In 1982, as the Houston area continued to grow, Lutheran High School was closed and split into two campuses administered by LEAH. One of the schools, Lutheran High School North, was opened on 1 October 1980 at 1130 W. 34th Street on the north side of the city. The other campus, Lutheran High School South, was opened at 7703 South Loop East, near the intersection of the 610 Loop and I-45. As the need for land grew in order to continue expansion, the decision was made for the school to relocate. In 1998, the Lutheran High School South campus was moved to 12555 Ryewater Drive on the south side of Houston. As expansion of the new campus continued, the school's name was changed to Lutheran South Academy with the addition of Lower and Middle school facilities.[1]

On March 5, 2012, Lutheran South Academy was awarded “Exemplary School” status by Christian Williams and National Lutheran Schools Accreditation Commission, one of seven Lutheran schools to receive the award in the United States, and the first in Texas.[2]

Campus

The Lutheran South Academy campus consists of five main buildings.

-   Building “A” houses the high school (grades 9-12).
-   Building “B” includes the cafeteria, gymnasium, athletic office and administrative offices.
-   Building “C” houses the lower school (grades PreK-5).
-   Building “D”, the newest building on campus, houses the middle school (grades 6-8). Construction began on the building in 2007 and it was opened for the 2009-2010 school year.

Athletics

High school

-   Baseball (boys)
-   Basketball (boys and girls)
-   Cheer (girls)
-   Cross country (boys and girls)
-   Football (boys)
-   Soccer (boys and girls)
-   Softball (girls)
-   Swimming (boys and girls)
-   Tennis (boys and girls)
-   Track and field (boys and girls)
-   Volleyball (girls)

Middle school

-   Baseball (boys)
-   Basketball (boys and girls)
-   Cheer (girls)
-   Cross country (boys and girls)
-   Football (boys)
-   Soccer
-   Softball (girls)
-   Track and field (boys and girls)
-   Volleyball (girls)
-   Tennis (boys and girls)
-   Swimming (boys and girls)
-   Golf (boys and girls)

School uniforms

Students are required to wear school uniforms.[3]

[1] “History/Structure.” _Lutheran South Academy_. Retrieved on November 16, 2008.

[2] “1”.Retrieved October 24, 2012.

[3] “Uniforms.” _Lutheran South Academy_. Retrieved on November 16, 2008.

title: Lutheran South Academy

question: Summarize the history and function of the Lutheran South Academy.

answer: The Lutheran Education Association of Houston opened the Lutheran High School in 1949. This campus was at 6901 Woodridge in Houston. In the 1980s, with the city's growth, the Lutheran Education Association of Houston split the campus, which was at 6901 Woodridge, into two schools. The Lutheran High School North was opened on 1 October 1980. The Lutheran High School South was opened at 7703 South Loop East. In 1998, the Lutheran High School South campus was moved to 12555 Ryewater Drive. The school's name was changed to and the addition of Lower and Middle school facilities was added, the school was now Lutheran South Academy. In 2012, the Lutheran South Academy was awarded "Exemplary School" by Christian Williams and the National Lutheran Schools Accreditation Commission.

critique: Details outside of the stated intent of the question should be removed.

critique: The first sentence is unnecessary and does not answer the question.

critique: The sentence about the campus' location is irrelevant.

critique: The school's name was changed to Lutheran South Academy in 1998, not the addition of Lower and Middle school facilities.

question: What does the article say about biology education at the Lutheran South Academy?

answer: No answer

critique: It is omitted that the school does not offer biology education.