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    When the world was young and innocent of Death, and Light ruled while Darkness slept, my sister and I lived in a garden. In this garden there were many beautiful things: plants and creatures alike. While we loved this garden, we were not the caretakers of it and knew not who the gardener was who had planted it or who it was that took care of it; yet it was always quite luscious and constantly thriving. One day while wandering throughout the garden we decided to rest under our favorite cherry tree, which was in full blossom.

    While we rested and talked, there came a great rush of air and a tremendous beating of wings above the tree where we sat. It was a bird that landed gracefully but powerfully in front of us. But this was not just a bird, no, this was a beast of a bird, a king of winged creatures, a lord of the skies. Its colors were that of the rainbow and its feathers many and soft to the eyes. Its size was enormous and great: nearly ten feet from beak to claw and its wingspan at least that twice. We were, of course, amazed at the size and greatness of this bird. We both watched in wonder as all the birds of the garden, and all the animals too, came to this beast’s feet and offered gifts of fruit, flowers, and dance and song. All the creatures in the garden seemed to fear and worship this magnificent bird.

    Then, after seeing the respect and adoration this winged master was receiving, we grew jealous and began to hate the bird and despise it for its beauty and power. We wanted the love and worship of the animals, for we were the blessed, the human, the masters of the garden–or so we deemed. We befriended this beautiful beast and then poisoned an apple and gave it to the bird as a gift. The bird ate it eagerly. Soon the beast was crying out in pain while my sister and I danced around him and his misery.
Soon after that, the creature breathed his last. But our jealousy had grown, as it always does. I cut off his head with my sword, and my sister and I pulled off every last one of his colorful feathers and made a coat out of them. We marched and we pranced around the garden with our pride and our lust, brightly colored, while all the animals bowed to us now and gave us their wealth and their loyalty.
Before long, the sky began to weep, and the raindrops washed away the blood on our hands but not on our hearts. With the rain came the guilt of our sin, the knowledge of our transgression–the fruit of our conscience.

    For we realized then just what it was we had done. We had destroyed something beautiful, we had horrified something lovely, we had damned something blessed. The beautiful beast was now nothing more than bones which were scattered on the ground. And so we set to work in utter desperation: to try and piece the bird back together again. Yet our foolish attempt to mend that which we had broken was in vain; for we were destroyers, not creators; we were haters, not lovers; were children, not gods.
The product we created was far from the beautiful creature that once ruled the garden. This was no animal we made, it was a machine. Yes a machine: one with many whining gears and moving parts. We had destroyed beauty, and sought to recreate that which only can be created, not produced or made with human hands; it was not beauty at all.  We watched helplessly as our machine went on a rampage, cutting and burning all the trees and plants in the garden, and forcing all the animals to flee from their once-beautiful homes.

     So there we stood, my sister and I, amidst the ruin of our garden, the trees aflame, beauty destroyed, perfection mutilated: by us and our machine. We left the garden and found a cave far off where we spent the rest of our days: in darkness and not light, in horror and not beauty: in Death and not Life.

title: Something Beautiful Destroyed

question: Summarize the process by which Death first entered the garden where the protagonists lived?

answer: The garden was in a paradise of youth where the sun, light and immortality reigned supreme. Death entered in the form of a rainbow-colored, ten-feet-wide bird that all the creatures worshipped. The protagonists saw the bird as a threat to their place of privilege in the garden, so they killed it and dressed themselves in its feathers before their guilt led them to take their own lives away and search the dark cave where they spent the rest of their days.

critique: The answer is a bit confusing and hard to read.

critique: The bird is not the first death in the garden.

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split: train

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SYED AFSAR MADAD NAQVI (; 10 August 193311 January 1997), was a prominent 20th-century's sculptor. He is best known for his pure realistic monumental sculptures which can be seen in many places around the country (such as Roshan Khan/Jahangir Khan Squash Complex, Fleet Club, Arts Council of Pakistan, Markaz-e-Sadaat-e-Amroha Centre, Hasan Square Karachi, Star Gate Karachi, Quaid-e-Azam International Airport, Village Restaurant, Metropol Hotel etc.). Afsar Madad Naqvi was a master Pakistani sculptor and painter. He was a founder member of the Central Institute of Arts and Crafts Karachi.

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Early life and education

Afsar Madad Naqvi was born in 1933 at Amroha, India. Diploma and Post-diploma from the Government College of Arts and Crafts, Lucknow, India. Trained under renowned sculptor Mohammad Hanif at Lucknow College of Arts and Crafts in the early 60s.

Career

He was one of the few qualified sculptors who could teach the technique of making life-size armature, simple casting and multiple casting with permanent moulds. He worked with great ease and facility in metals, wood, cement, Plaster of Paris, marble, stone and clay.[1]

He came to Pakistan in 1962 and shortly after that and had a solo show at the Karachi Arts Council Hall, which was also the country's first solo sculpture exhibition. When Mr. Nawabzada Wajid Mehmood founded the Central Institute of Arts and Crafts, he requested him to set up the sculpture studio and he have lived up to this responsibility since then.

Afsar Naqvi was sculptor, traditionalist, loyal friend and affectionate teacher. He had a huge following of artists in Pakistan, most of whom were his students.

His acute observation of detail, timeless dedication to craftsmanship and the innate soul of a master allows him to breathe life into any work of art from delicate pencil sketch to monumental sculptures and that is truly make him one of the world's top artists.[2]

Friend and contemporary to leading artists and literary figures, Afsar Naqvi is a quiet, retiring man and has spent the better part of the last twenty five years teaching sculpture to a generation of artists at the institute. In his work, Sir Naqvi is an exponent of the Eastern idiom. His deep rooted aesthetics of the sub-continental culture bond us to the past. Many art scholar would have us believe that Mughal miniature and folk art are our only heritage when Classical Indian art forms the very core of this region's art history.

He was highly skilled in his craft, his long finger nimbly created small figurines in clay while he carried on with his discussions, as if they had a life of their own. While fame eluded him as a Master Sculptor his skills earned high great respect and his advise was always sought in technical matters, for which he was seldom financially compensated.

Afsar Naqvi's vision and aesthetics was indelibly etched into his own creative expression and his drive to achieve the same level of perfection in his master work.

Biography (by year)

1933 – Born- Amroha, India

1960 – Diploma and Post-diploma- Government College of Arts and Crafts Lucknow, India

1962 – Migration- Pakistan, Karachi

1962 – Joined Central Institute of Art & Crafts, Karachi as Head of Sculpture Department

1963 – Solo Exhibition- Arts Council of Pakistan, Karachi

1969 – Solo Exhibition- Pakistan American Cultural Centre (P.A.C.C.)

1971 – Solo Exhibition- Indus Gallery, Karachi

1975 – Solo Exhibition- Arts Council of Pakistan, Karachi

1985 – Group Exhibition- The Fifth National Arts Exhibition, Idara Saqafat -e- Pakistan

1992 – Joined North City School of Art & Architecture, Karachi as Principle and Head of Fine Art (Sculpture) Department

1995 – Founded Bhittai Institute of Art & Crafts

1997 – Death

1997 – Solo Exhibition – A tribute to Afsar Madad Naqvi, Arts Council of Pakistan, Karachi

Specialization

Specialized in portraiture, mural work, and terra-cotta. He has done lot of masterpiece sculptures in wood, metal, plaster, cement and terra-cotta. Indian Classical sculpture, Naqvi's ability to be able to capture in wood, stone or metal the essence of a narrative moment with a dramatic naturalistic realism.

Notes

[1] Amroha Society Pakistan,

[2] Syed Hasan Naqvi, http://afsarnaqvi.wordpress.com/

title: Afsar Madad Naqvi

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MAGANG (GROUP) HOLDING CO., LTD.,[1] or known as MASTEEL GROUP, is one of the major Chinese iron and steel enterprises. Since 2019, it is a joint venture of central government owned China Baowu Steel Group and Anhui Provincial People's Government's State-owned Assets Supervision and Administration Commission (SASAC). It is headquartered in Ma'anshan, Anhui province. The group produced iron and steel via its listed subsidiary Maanshan Iron and Steel Company Limited, which was a listed company since 1993. However, the group had a significant part remained unlisted.

In Chinese language, the company was nicknamed as “_A flower of Jiangnan_”.[2]

History

[former logo] Masteel Group, as a steel plant, was founded in 1953 as “Ma'anshan Iron Mining Plant”.[3] () In 1958, it was renamed to “Ma'anshan Iron and Steel Company”,[4] ( or transliterated as “Ma'anshan Iron and Steel Corporation”). In the 1950s, it was considered as one of the 5 medium-sized steel plants of the People's Republic of China, behind the top 3 at that time: Anshan, Wuhan and Baotou.[5]

According to the company, the steel plant was the first Chinese manufacturer of train wheel and tires, which was first produced in 1962.[6] As of 1993, the train wheel and tire production lines of the group were unique () in the People's Republic of China.[7]

In 1970, a limestone mine located in Chuanshan, Zhenjiang city, was under the administration of the group. However, after the establishment of Shanghai Baoshan Iron and Steel, the mine became a supplier of Baoshan Iron & Steel instead. The administration of the mine was also transferred to the metallurgical bureau of Zhenjiang city.[8]

According to _Financial Times_, in the 1980s to 1990s, 85% of the tax revenue of the Ma'anshan city, were contributed by the group. The group also employed 90,000 out of 2 million citizens at its peak.[9]

1990s to present

In 1993, a subsidiary was incorporated as Maanshan Iron and Steel Company Limited (), which the original “Ma'anshan Iron and Steel Company” was renamed to “Magang Holding Company” ().[10] The former was listed on the Stock Exchange of Hong Kong on 3 November 1993[11] and the Shanghai Stock Exchange on 6 January 1994;[12] the latter, was renamed to Magang (Group) Holding Company Limited () in 1998.[13] Magang (Group) Holding Company Limited was also known as Masteel Group () for short. Maanshan Iron and Steel Company Limited was one of the first state-owned enterprises of the People's Republic of China to be a listed company.[14] It was also the largest H shares initial public offering at that time.[15]

After the split, Masteel Group had transformed into a holding company which owns the controlling stake of the listed company, as well as other auxiliary divisions such as education, hospitals and mining.[16] According to news report, the unlisted portion of the group also had a property development division. In 2012, the public relation division of the group had told the journalist that the real estates were for the employees of the group, and not-for-sale to the general public.[17] However, some of the fellow steel producers were selling their developed property to the general public.[18] Nevertheless, Masteel Group purchased a land in 2009, but sold the land and the properties that was under construction to other investors in 2018.[19] A section of that land had been developed by Masteel Group and the apartments and house were sold already.[20]

In 2003, the university of the group for the continuous education of the staff (), was transformed into Anhui Vocational College of Metallurgy and Technology (). The university itself was founded in 1983.[21]

In 2004, Masteel Group transferred 17 primary and secondary schools to the relevant provincial authority.[22] In 2005, the hospital of the group was sold to the employees of the hospital, with the group retained 27.79% shares.[23] Hengkang Medical Group (), a listed company, was attempted to purchase the hospital from the new owners in 2018.[24] As of 2018, Masteel Group still owned 6.48% shares of the hospital.[25]

After not involving in steel business directly since the establishment of the listed subsidiary in 1993, the Masteel Group and the listed subsidiary formed a joint venture in trading scarp steel in 2012,[26] which Masteel Group owned 55% stake of the joint venture, while the listed subsidiary owned 45% stake. In 2019, a capital increase of the scarp steel trading joint venture was announced.[27]

In terms of assets, as at 31 December 2015, Masteel Group, including the listed subsidiary, owned of total assets in consolidated financial statement in the Chinese accounting standards.[28] In the same reporting period, the listed subsidiary owned .[29]

According to a news report, the mining subsidiary of Masteel Group () had significantly invested in mine rehabilitation, which from 2014 to the date of the news article was written (circa 2018), the subsidiary had planted 12,000 trees, as well as a capital investment of more than .[30] The subsidiary was established in 2011 by merging subsidiaries and divisions into one subsidiary; The mining subsidiary owned 5 mines, namely: , , , and .[31]

In mid-2019, central government owned China Baowu Steel Group acquired 51% stake of Masteel Group from the State-owned Assets Supervision and Administration Commission (SASAC) of for free. The acquisition also included the indirect controlling stake (45.54%) of the list subsidiary Maanshan Iron and Steel Co., Ltd..[32] Baowu was owned by Central Government (The State Council)'s SASAC. According to World Steel Association, China Baowu Steel Group was the world second-largest steel producer by volume in year 2018, while Masteel Group was ranked the 16th. In 2018, China Baowu Steel Group and their subsidiaries had produced 67.43 million metric tons of steel, while Masteel Group, including the subsidiary Maanshan Iron and Steel Co., Ltd., had produced 19.64 million metric tons.[33]{{#tag:ref|The listed subsidiary of Masteel Group, disclosed that the company had produced 19.64 million metric tons of crude steel and had further processed into 18.70 million metric tons of steel.[34]|group=“nb”}} It was speculated by the journalist that the enlarged China Baowu Steel Group could reach 100 million metric tons of steel production capacity by their methodology,[35]{{#tag:ref|For example, World Steel Association had stated “30%-50% ownership, pro-rata tonnage is included” and not including minority ownership (less than 30% ownership).[36]|group=“nb”}} despite by equity ratio, Baowu only owned 22.23% shares of the indirect subsidiary Maanshan Iron and Steel Co., Ltd., the steel production entity of Masteel Group.

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title: Masteel Group

question: Summarize the politics involved in owning a steel company in China.

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question: Summarize the roots of the Masteel Group.

answer: The Masteel Group was founded in 1953 and was known as Ma'anshan (Iron) Mining (Co.) initially. In the 1950s, it was considered one of the five medium-sized steel plants of the People's Republic of China behind Anshan, Baotou, and Wuhan. Masteel specialized in producing train wheels, manufactured in 1962; and in the 1970s, it had a limestone mine in Chuanshan, Zhenjiang. By the 1980s, 85% of the tax revenue of the town of Ma'anshan was supported by the Group. Masteel was one of the first state-owned enterprises of the People's Republic of China to be a listed company. In 2018, the company was acquired by the China Baowu Steel Group.

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iPhone Screenshots

UTS is an Indian Railways official iOS mobile ticketing application which allows the daily train travellers to book unreserved tickets of Indian Railways using their Smartphone. The application is designed in such a way that it is easy to use and has user friendly interface with features like book ticket, cancel ticket, maintain their profile, manage frequent travel routes , etc.The passenger will use Railway wallet to book the ticket.
There are two modes for booking Tickets : (i) Paper (ii) Paperless. In case of paper ticket user has to take a printout from kiosk/counter at concerned station. Whereas in case of Paperless ticket user's Location will be captured to determine he/she is present in valid ticketing area. In this mode no printout is required and the user can directly show his ticket from his smartphone to the TTE. Moreover an alternative to location check has also been introduced in limited stations where a user can scan a unique barcode present at station premises to book his paperless ticket.

What’s New

* Newly designed user interface.
* Easy navigation for all types of bookings.
* Bug fixes

Ratings and Reviews

4.6 out of 5

72.8K Ratings

Most awaited app

  The developer should understand the urgency of the user and the impact on the current on going situation, here are few bugs I would like to list

  1) if the selected stations shows some error or ticket can’t be booked message, user can restart ans does the same and bang!! It works so the parameters aren’t right? Or its just a bug

  2) update would be needed that if the user wants to travel form multiple station to particular station , fastest route and the amount should be shown in order to give them convince and this would help the newbie in the city

Horrible App

  This app is nightmare to use. I want to know who developed this app. After entering all the details it will ask to login and register. After registration again you need to start from the beginning. After booking, if you select show ticket it will say no active ticket found. If you click on booking history it will ask to login. Login and try again it will display partial ticket, click on it for more details instead it will ask you whether you want to rebook the ticket. What the hell and top of that beside my ticket it will show next trains. What the hell I am supposed to with next train and why it’s getting displayed in booking history. Ticket id in Booking history and Cancel ticket are different. I can’t logout and login from different mobile it says my imei verification under progress. One more thing, how the common man should know whether the train is slow, express of super fast especially express and super fast in India train does not make any difference instead could have provided Option to select train which is much easier. Did the people get paid to rate so much for this under developed app? School kids will do a better job.

Very bad performance in location option and login

  What the hell developer doing, in my i phone i set my location, even your app shows you have to be far 25km or 5km away from station and rail track res. Another interesting thing i found in app when i tried to book my actual journey ticket which is of 80/- it shows message like you have to be far from station 25km ( even i am far as 15km from station) then forcefully i booked ticket which is before station from where actually my journey start. And you know what it booked successfully. For that i have to pay 100. No matter 20/- is not big amount but if we calculate #ghotala like this 20 or 10 *10,000=1,00,000. Omg 1 lack. And this is just my prediction amount might be you are doing ghotala with lots of people. So please government is already rich dont do this else we will become poor. Mehanat ka kamate hai bhai kursi par ya sarkari logo ki trah baithkar sirf pise nahi aate. 10-11 hrs kaam karte hai sharir tutane tak tab jakar kuch pise aate hai hath me. Aur tum baith jaate hume lootane ke liye

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    Centre for Railway Information Systems

Size
    75.7 MB

Category
    Travel

Compatibility

    Requires iOS 9.0 or later. Compatible with iPhone, iPad and iPod touch.

Age Rating
    4+

Copyright
    © 2018 Centre for Railway Information Systems

Price
    Free

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I stare down at my arm. It’s so pale and unblemished. I slowly lift up my razor blade. I can feel it’s cold anticipation, ready to tear my skin apart, which is exactly what it’s going to do. I drag it across my flesh in a long slow drag. I watch as the warm crimson spreads. My arm, my clothes, -nothing remains dry. Why do I do this to myself? I keep saying that I’m going to stop.
	Suddenly there is a knock at my door. I panic. I wrap a dirty cloth around my arm and run into the hotel closet. “Get out here right now you little bitch.” I can already tell who it is from their voice. My drug dealer. As I’m crouching in the closet I try to slow my breathing, but my heart jumps when the door is kicked in. There’s a tiny hole in the closet door, and I lean forward to put my eye to it. I can see he’s brought company. They’ve moved into another area of my hotel room, possibly the kitchen. I close my eyes as I strain to hear them, but by the time I open my eyes I’m too late. I feel a searing hot rod force its way into the back of my skull. I can’t stop screaming, and that attracts the rest of the men.
	I have no choice but to obey. I come out of the closet quietly while they tie me up.  I try to remain calm, but I falter as the boss begins to talk. “Guess what Sabrina? I woke up today and I found all my drugs and money gone. You’re the last person I’ve sold to in days. What did you do with them?
	I have no idea what he’s talking about. He’s probably high right now. But then I suddenly remember something. The razor blade on my bed. At the current moment they have me tied up, lying face down on the floor. I look up at him and use my most innocent voice. “I didn’t do it, but I know who did. But right now I’m a little uncomfortable. You can keep me tied up, but please let me lie down on the bed. “
	“Why should I care if you’re comfortable or not?”
“Because otherwise I’m not  going to say a thing.”
	“I guess I’ll just have to beat it outta ya.”
I smile a cocky grin. “You already poked out one of my eyes and I haven’t said anything yet.” I hear him curse under his breath as he throws me onto the bed.  Within seconds I find the razor blade and start to cut at the rope that imprisons me. I’m done quickly and he doesn’t even notice.
	“Quite stalling and tell me something already.”
“Oh, I’ll tell you something.”
	“what’s that?”
“you’re going to die.”
I throw my razor, quick and sleek, and watch as his blood spurts out. His goonies have seen enough, and bolt for the door.  They think they’re going to get away, but they’re not. I grab the two closest things on the end table next to my bed, a pen and a vase. I sprint out my door and quickly catch them in the parking garage. The first assailant makes the mistake of turning around to look at me, and I smash the vase into his face, sending a million shards of glass into his eyes, flesh, and even mouth. I grab a piece before it hits the ground and I kill him like I did his boss, by slicing his throat. This whole time his buddy has just been standing there, watching me kill him. Once his friend is done it’s only me and him, and he has my full attention. I take my pen and jab it into his right eye, just like the one that got damaged on my own face less than five minutes ago. I quickly pluck the pen back out and sink it into his heart, and let his body drop. I don’t care about the mess, let the staff clean it up.

title: Short story 1 (warning:bloddy/gore)

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“LITTLE DARLIN'” is a popular Top 40 song, made famous by the Diamonds.[1]

The Gladiolas' version

It was written by Maurice Williams with both melody and doo-wop accompaniment strongly emphasizing the clave rhythm. It was first recorded by Excello Records in January 1957 and quickly released as a rhythm-and-blues song by Williams' R&B group, the Gladiolas. The song is noted for its spoken recitation by the lead singer (“My Darlin' I need you...”). The Gladiolas, featuring Williams, were from Lancaster, South Carolina, where they had been together since high school. Their original version of the song was on the small Excello label. (Excello primarily recording “swamp blues” songs in Crowley, Louisiana.) The Gladiolas song peaked at No. 11 on the R&B charts in April 1957, but barely dented the hot 100. By 1959, Williams' group became “Maurice Williams and the Zodiacs” with the rock 'n roll-R&B hit “Stay.”

The Gladiolas' version was included in Robert Christgau's “Basic Record Library” of 1950s and 1960s recordings, published in _Christgau's Record Guide: Rock Albums of the Seventies_ (1981).[2]

The Diamonds' version

The Diamonds' successful cover version followed a month later.[3] The Diamonds were a Canadian pop group that evolved into a doo-wop group. The Diamonds' version reached number two in sales for eight weeks on the _Billboard_ Hot 100. _Billboard_ ranked this version as the No. 3 song for 1957.

The Diamonds' version is generally considered superior. Allmusic critic Stephen Thomas Erlewine argues that the Diamonds Little Darlin' is an unusual example of a cover being better than the original:

  [T]he Diamonds' take remained the bigger hit, and over the years, the better-known version. Normally, this would have been an outrage, but there's a reason why the Diamonds' version has sustained its popularity over the years: it's a better, fiercer recording. Both versions are good, even if they're a little silly, because it's a good doo wop song, giving each member of the quartet a lot to do. At times, the vocal phrases verge on self-parody -- the “ai-ya-yi-yai-yai-ya”'s or the “wella-wella”'s -- which may be why The Diamonds' version is superior.[4]

On the Pop Chronicles, host John Gilliland claimed that their version was in fact a parody of the genre.[5] Nonetheless, Little Darlin' (primarily the Diamonds' version, but to some extent the Gladiolas' version) remains an all-time rock 'n roll R&B classic.[6]

Other recordings

-   Elvis Presley performed the song and a version appears on his final album, _Moody Blue_ (1977).
-   Rock-and-roll-revival group Sha Na Na performed “Little Darlin'” at the Woodstock Festival in 1969.
-   The Four Seasons
-   The Monkees performed a live version on their 1969 TV special _33⅓ Revolutions Per Monkee_.
-   Joan Baez performed a parody version in concert in the early 1960s which appears on the 1983 compilation _Very Early Joan_. The title song of her album _Honest Lullaby_ (1979) quotes the vocal hook of “Little Darlin'”.
-   Classics IV
-   The Rocky Fellers
-   The Chevrons
-   Victor Wood(1971)

In popular culture

-   The recording by The Diamonds is featured on the soundtrack of the 1973 film _American Graffiti_.
-   The song is performed by Warren Beatty and Dustin Hoffman in the 1987 film _Ishtar_.

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title: Little Darlin'

question: What does the article say about the song 'Little Darling'?

answer: The song was released as a rhythm and blues song by Williams' R&B group, the Gladiolas. It was republished by The Diamonds in April 1957, who recorded a cover of the song. The Diamonds' cover is generally considered to be better than the original. The song remains an all-time rock 'n roll R&B classic. It was included in Robert Christgau's “Basic Record Library” of 1950s and 1960s recordings.

critique: The answer omits that the song was originally released in January 1957.

critique: The omitted details include: The Gladiolas version hit number 11 on the R&B charts in April 1957. Elvis Presley performed the song and a version appears on his final album, Elvis: Moody Blue. Rock-and-roll-revival group Sha Na Na performed “Little Darlin'” at the Woodstock Festival in 1969.

critique: The answer should mention the Gladiolas' version.

critique: The article doesn't say the song was republished by the Diamonds, but that the Diamonds' version followed a month after the original release.

critique: "The Diamonds' cover is generally considered to be better than the original." - this is inaccurate because the Diamonds' cover is not better than the original. The Diamonds' cover is considered to be better than the Gladiolas' version.

critique: The answer should mention Elvis Presley's version of the song.

critique: The song was released as a rhythm and blues song by Williams' R&B group, the Gladiolas. It was first recorded by Excello Records in January 1957 and quickly released as a rhythm-and-blues song by Williams' R&B group, the Gladiolas. The Diamonds' cover is generally considered to be better than the original. The song remains an all-time rock 'n roll R&B classic. It was included in Robert Christgau's “Basic Record Library” of 1950s and 1960s recordings.

question: What does the article say about Presley's first album?

answer: No answer

critique: His first album (along with many other musicians) is "Moody Blue".


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_TERENTIUS ET DELUSOR_[1] is an anonymous poetical treatise, variously described as a dialogue[2] or spoken play,[3] preserved only in fragments in a twelfth-century manuscript. It is the earliest example of the author or presenter of a play appearing as a person in the work, and in this case both appear: Terence and the (critical) theatrical producer (_persona delusoris_). The poem was probably acted or recited before a performance of one of Terence's works.[4][5] It has been dated to the fifth century,[6] the seventh,[7] between the seventh and eleventh,[8] the ninth or tenth century,[9] and the Carolingian Renaissance (ninth century).[10] The piece often finds mention beside Roswitha, who composed Christian dramas in Terentian style.

The plot of the brief performance piece is that the producer criticises Terence's plays as boring and out of style. Terence then proceeds to defend his work, probably ultimately submitting it to the judgement of the audience, who then viewed a performance of one of his plays. The play was probably mimed while the Terence character recited it, “in the manner thought to be characteristic of actual Roman performances.”[11] The short piece testifies, however, to the lack of certainty about ancient practice. _An sit prosaicum nescio an metricum_ says the producer about the drama of Plautus: “we do not know whether they may be prose or meter.”[12]

_Terentius et delusor_ was given its first modern edition, with annotations, by Charles Magnin in the _Bibliothèque de l'École des Chartes_ (vol. 1:1839–40, pp. 517–535), where he titled it “Fragment d'un comique inédit du septième siècle” (Fragment of an unedited comedy of the seventh century). Next, Paul von Winterfeld edited the poem for _Hrotsvithae Opera_, xx–xxiii, in MGH SS rerum Germanicarum (Berlin: 1902). An updated version was made by Karl Strecker for MGH, _Poetae Latini aevi Carolini_, IV, 1088–90, in 1923 and for _Hrotsvithae Opera_ in 1930. It has since appeared (without translation) in Appendix V, 326–328, of volume II of E. K. Chambers' _The Medieval Stage_.

Sources

-   Chambers, Edmund Kerchever (1903). _The Mediaeval Stage_, 2 vols. Oxford. .
-   Dronke, Peter (1984). _Women Writers of the Middle Ages: A Critical Study of Texts from Perpetua (+203) to Marguerite Porete (+1310)_. Cambridge: Cambridge University Press.
-   Dronke, Peter, ed. and trans. (1994). _Nine Medieval Latin Plays_. Cambridge Medieval Classics I. Cambridge: Cambridge University Press. .
-   Segal, Erich (2001). _The Death of Comedy_. Harvard University Press. .
-   Tydeman, William (1978). _The Theatre in the Middle Ages: Western European Stage Conditions c. 800–1576_. Cambridge: Cambridge University Press.
-   Manso, Francisco Nodar (1990). _Teatro Menor Galaico-Portugués (Siglo XIII): Reconstrucción Contextual y Teoría del Discurso_. Edition Reichenberger. .
-   Menéndez y Pelayo, Marcelino. _La Celestina: Razones para tratar de esta obra dramática en la historia de la novela española_. Buenos Aires: Espasa-Calpe, 1947.
-   Ogilvy, J. D. A. (1963). “_Mimi_, _Scurrae_, _Histriones_: Entertainers of the Early Middle Ages.” _Speculum_, 38:4 (October), pp. 603–619.

Notes

Category:Medieval drama Category:Early medieval Latin literature

[1] Translated “Terence and the Heckler” by Erich Segal and “Altercation between Terence and his Critic” by Peter Dronke.

[2] Segal, 221.

[3] Dronke, _Nine Medieval Latin Plays_, xvii.

[4] Ogilvy, 619.

[5] Dronke, _Women Writers of the Middle Ages_, 58, notes that there are directions for movement (_nunc Terentius exit foras audiens haec et ait_, “now Terence comes out, hearing this, and says”), for asides to the audience, and for impersonation, all implying performance. This would have been less like a “staged” play and more like a _scenica lectio_ (acted reading), which was known in the twelfth century as a method of “doing” Terence.

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[7] Magnin, according to Menéndez y Pelayo, chapt. 7.

[8] Chambers, 85.

[9] Manso, 116.

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[11] Manso, 116, quoting Tydeman, 26.

[12] Menéndez y Pelayo, chapt. 7; Segal, 221.

title: Terentius et delusor

question: What does the text say about Terence's plays?

answer: Terence's plays are criticized by the theatrical producer as boring and out of style. Terence defends his work, and the audience views a performance of one of his plays. The play was probably mimed while the Terence character recited it.

critique: The play had to have been vivdly presented and not just recited to show its merits. This should be clarified in the answer.

critique: The answer should mention that Terence's plays may or may not be in meter.

critique: The answer should mention that the play was probably mimed while the Terence character recited it.

critique: The answer should mention the uncertainty about ancient practice.

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KAMOKUIKI (c. 1795 – September 26, 1840) was a grandmother of the last two ruling monarchs of the Kingdom of Hawaii.

Life

Kamokuiki was born about 1795 as a daughter of the chief Kanepawale, son of Kaʻihelemoana and Kaʻopa, and his wife chiefess Uaua, daughter of Kaʻehunuiamamaliʻi and Koʻi. Her grandfather's sister was Hikuikekualono, the mother of Kahaopulani, who according to legend hid and nursed the baby Kamehameha I during his infancy when he was being hunted down by Alapainui.[1]

Kamokuiki married High Chief Kamanawa II and with him had a son, Caesar Kapaʻakea (1815–1866). She also had a daughter named Kekahili by another husband named Alapaimaloiki.[2] The House of Kalākaua descends from her son Kapaʻakea. The House of Kawānanakoa descends from her daughter Kekahili.

After converting to Christianity, Kamokuiki grew disgusted at her husband Kamanawa's many affairs. In 1840, she divorced him for the crime of adultery. Kamanawa was not allowed to remarry while she was alive. Six weeks after the divorce, Kamokuiki died in Honolulu on September 26, 1840.[3] Two days later an autopsy was performed on her body and her stomach was discovered to be “much inflamed, while everything else was in order.” Her ex-husband and his accomplice Lonoapuakau were arrested and placed in chains. They had poisoned her “‘awa” (a name for kava, a narcotic drink) with fatal doses of the fishing poisons ʻākia and ʻauhuhu. They were both tried by a jury of twelve chiefs and found guilty of her murder. They were hanged in the Honolulu Fort on October 20, 1840, the first two to be prosecuted under the criminal laws adopted in the Hawaiian constitution of 1840. Charles Wilkes of the United States Exploring Expedition was in Honolulu during the murder and subsequent trial. Calling her “Kamakinki”, Wilkes recounted how the cries of the natives mourning the death of Kamokuiki kept him awake at night, describing it as “one of the most startling and mournful sounds I ever heard which lasted all night, and disturbed the whole town of Honolulu.”

This incident left a mark on the family and would negatively affect public opinion of Kamokuiki's grandson Kalākaua during his campaign for the throne in 1874. Later opponents of Kalākaua and his sister and successor Liliʻuokalani would use the murder case as an example of their family's idolatrous tendencies.

Kamokuiki's remains are interred in the cemetery of the Kawaiahaʻo Church, in the Kapiʻolani family plot. Her husband Alapaimaloiki, Kūhiō Kalanianaʻole, the father of Queen Kapiʻolani, and other relatives of Elizabeth Kahanu Kalanianaʻole are also buried here. Today, an obelisk marks where the Kapiʻolani family plot is located.[4] Most of her royal descendants are buried at the Royal Mausoleum at Mauna ʻAla.

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title: Kamokuiki

question: Summarize Kamokuiki's family members.

answer: Kamokuiki was born to the chief Kanepawale and his wife chiefess Uaua. She married High Chief Kamanawa II and had a son, Caesar Kapaʻakea, and a daughter, Kekahili. Her son was the father of the House of Kalākaua, and her daughter was the mother of the House of Kawānanakoa.

critique: The answer should mention that Kamanawa was her husband.

question: What does the text say about Kamokuiki's relationship with Kamanawa?

answer: Kamokuiki married High Chief Kamanawa II, and they had a son, Caesar Kapaʻakea, and a daughter named Kekahili. After converting to Christianity, she grew disgusted with Kamanawa's many affairs, so she divorced him for the crime of adultery. Six weeks after the divorce, she died and Kamanawa was arrested and charged with her murder for poisoning her with fishing poisons.

critique: The answer should mention that Kamanawa was not allowed to remarry while she was alive.

question: Summarize the most interesting event in this text.

answer: Kamokuiki was married to High Chief Kamanawa II, but she divorced him because he had affairs. Six weeks after the divorce, she died. Her ex-husband and his accomplice Lonoapuakau were arrested and placed in chains. They had poisoned her with fishing poisons. They were both tried by a jury of twelve chiefs and found guilty of her murder. They were hanged in the Honolulu Fort on October 20, 1840.

critique: The answer should mention that the poisoning was the most interesting event.

critique: The answer should include the fact that Charles Wilkes, an American explorer, witnessed the entire incident and described it as "one of the most startling and mournful sounds I ever heard."

critique: "They had poisoned her with fishing poisons." - this is incorrect. They had poisoned her "awa" (a name for kava, a narcotic drink) with fatal doses of the fishing poisons ʻākia and ʻauhuhu.

critique: The answer should mention that the poisoning was done to prevent her from remarrying.

critique: The answer omits that the poisoning was discovered at an autopsy. It also omits that the poisoners were tried and executed.

critique: The answer should include that the poisoning was done to prevent Kamanawa from remarrying.

critique: It's omitted that this incident left a mark on the family of Kamokuiki and negatively affected public opinion of her grandson.

question: What does the text say about manslaughter?

answer: No answer

critique: The response misses to answer the instruction in the task.

critique: The answer should mention that manslaughter is not discussed in the text.


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The days of relying on neighbours to dob in landlords who have illegally crammed tenants into houses and apartments may soon be over.

Instead the NSW Government will harness big data to crack down on illegal boarding houses across Sydney.

Information from sources such as the electoral roll, utility bill companies as well as complaints from Fair Trading, will be collected and used to find where more people are living than is being claimed, Minister for Innovation and Better Regulation Victor Dominello told _Domain_.

The project from the NSW Data Analytics Centre uses a Big Data approach, where many sets of information are collected and interpreted to fit the puzzle pieces together, Mr Dominello said.

“By comparing the water use for a standard two-bedroom apartment with one that has many residents could be the first alert of an illegal boarding house,” he said.

  [Illegal accommodation is] an indication of how dysfunctional our housing system is.Ned Cutcher, Tenants Union NSW

With the addition of complaints made to Fair Trading, a compelling case that the home might be an illegal boarding house could be built.

“If you know the Big Data, then, rather than knocking on 100 doors, we can do 10 targeted homes and it’s likely a slumlord will be behind one of them,” he said.

In authorised boarding houses, a maximum of two people can share a bedroom at the request of a resident. A room for one person should be no smaller than 7.5 square metres, or 11 square metres for two people.

-   Related: Inspecting an illegal rooming house
-   Related: The high cost of renting a bed in Australia’s capital cities

In illegal boarding houses, four people may share the same sleeping area and partitions may be created using shower curtains to turn living rooms into bedrooms.

For Mr Dominello, it has been a long journey towards better enforcement against “horrendous practices that can be devastating to the community”.

Since doorknocking in 2008 alerted him to slums operating in his electorate of Ryde, he was instrumental in creating the Boarding Houses Act 2012 to create a registration program for boarding houses and bringing in basic standards.

“This is still a serious issue, particularly in highly developed areas,” he said.

Sometimes, the location of illegal accommodation is only revealed after disaster strikes.

At the moment, councils rely on neighbourhood complaints, circumstantial evidence and door-knocks to find slums. Complaints often come from neighbours of overflowing bins, or unkempt homes, while stuffed letterboxes can also be a sign.

In May 2015, the City of Sydney established a dedicated investigation team to identify illegal accommodation operators across their council area.

Over the past 12 months, they led 30 search warrants and carried out 30 suspect interviews. The evidence is being used to formulate two cases, a spokesperson said.

About 100 premises have been inspected in the local government area. In one investigation, 58 beds were found crammed in a three-bedroom house in Ultimo, including a bed in the bathroom and laundry.

[In 2015, a City of Sydney investigation found a bed in a bathroom of an illegal accommodation in the CBD. ]

_In 2015, a City of Sydney investigation found a bed in a bathroom of an illegal accommodation in the CBD. Photo: City of Sydney_

“The team has issued fines totalling $75,000, and is currently undertaking criminal proceedings in the NSW Land and Environment Court in relation to unauthorised use of an industrial estate for short term accommodation,” they said.

Tenants Union of NSW senior policy officer Ned Cutcher said boarding houses threatened overcrowding, health problems and safety issues for marginal renters.

“People working in tenancy advice and advocacy services find [tenants subject to] interpersonal problems, assault and inappropriate treatment,” Mr Cutcher said.

Tenants of these situations would also find their rights falling under Common Law, meaning they would be unable to go to Tribunal to solve their issues and would have to fund a case through the Supreme Court. For most, the expense could make it “difficult to recover the money paid” as a bond.

“[Illegal accommodation is] an indication of how dysfunctional our housing system is,” he said, pointing to affordability issues that push people into overcrowded rental situations.

A review of boarding houses legislation is scheduled to take place in 2017.

question: Summarize why cramming people into small areas is a bad thing.

answer: The author of the article explicitly states that cramming people into small areas is a bad thing. This can lead to health problems, safety issues, interpersonal problems, assault, and inappropriate treatment.

critique: The answer should mention the financial burden placed on tenants.

critique: The answer is a bit too vague. It should mention the specific problems mentioned in the article.

text: The first sentence is unnecessary and not quite correct anyway.

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text:
Cancer Screening Saves Lives!

HAVE YOU BEEN SCREENED FOR CANCER? SHOULD YOU?

Cancer screening means getting "checked" for cancer. Cancer Screening:

-   is for people who have no signs or symptoms of cancer.
-   can prevent some cancers by finding and treating changes before they develop into cancer.
-   can find cancer early when treatment may work better.

About Us

CancerCare Manitoba has 3 organized cancer screening programs: BreastCheck, CervixCheck and ColonCheck.

OUR GOAL IS TO DECREASE DEATHS FROM BREAST, CERVIX AND COLON CANCER.

Our programs:

-   provide screening tests to Manitobans and partner with healthcare providers to increase access to cancer screening services across the province,
-   use letters to invite and remind Manitobans to get screened and notify them of results,
-   work with healthcare providers to ensure that individuals with abnormal screening results get the follow-up care they need, and
-   provide information and resources to the public and healthcare providers.

To learn more about screening for other cancers talk to your healthcare provider or click here.

Privacy

Manitoba Health Seniors and Active Living provides the screening programs with information to know who to invite for screening, including:

-   name, address, and date of birth
-   personal health identification number (PHIN) and Manitoba medical number (MHSC)

You can be confident that your information is kept secure, private and confidential at all times. BreastCheck, CervixCheck and ColonCheck follow the Manitoba Personal Health Information Act (PHIA). This means that:

-   your personal health information is private and confidential.
-   all program staff have signed a pledge of confidentiality.

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Program Participation Options

While there are many benefits to being included in BreastCheck, CervixCheck and ColonCheck, we realize some Manitobans might not want to receive communication from us or participate at this time.

If you do not want to receive letters from the Screening Programs please call 1-855-95-CHECK. For information about your options regarding the Pap Test Registry, click here.

Screening for Other Cancers

To learn more about screening for cancers other than breast, cervical, or colorectal, click here.

Cancer Screening in Your Community

BreastCheck, CervixCheck and ColonCheck partner to support access to cancer screening. Take initiative in your community! Click hereto learn more about how you can promote cancer screening and access to cancer screening in your community.

News

BreastCheck Update: August 26, 2020

-   Effective September 1, 2020, all BreastCheck clients must wear non-medical masks for the duration of
    their breast screening appointments.
-   BreastCheck is offering appointments at all sites.
-   As always, if you are experiencing any breast symptoms please talk to your primary care provider.

ColonCheck Update: July 27, 2020

-   ColonCheck is now mailing home screening test kits.
-   Requests for test kits are now being accepted.
-   If you are experiencing persistent symptoms, talk to your primary care provider.

Call 1-855-95-CHECK if you have questions or concerns.

Cancer Prevention in Canada: What Can We Do? webinar

-   Join us Thursday, February 4, 2021 from 12:00 - 1:00pm (CST) for an interactive webinar about current cancer trends and how we can make an impact on the future burden of cancer in Manitoba. Click here to register.

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question: What does the text say about screening for throat cancer?

answer: No answer

question: What does the text say about cancer screening?

answer: Cancer screening means getting "checked" for cancer. Cancer screening can prevent some cancers by finding and treating changes before they develop into cancer. Cancer screening can find cancer early when treatment may work better. CancerCare Manitoba has three organized cancer screening programs: BreastCheck, CervixCheck, and ColonCheck.

critique: The answer should mention the goal of the programs.

critique: The text should mention what cancer screening isn't.

critique: The answer should mention the goal of the three cancer screening programs.

critique: The answer omits that Manitoba Health Seniors and Active Living provides the screening programs with information to know who to invite for screening.

critique: Remove the last sentence of the answer, as it's not relevant to the question.

question: What does the text say about CancerCare Manitoba?

answer: CancerCare Manitoba has three organized cancer screening programs: BreastCheck, CervixCheck, and ColonCheck. Their goal is to decrease deaths from breast, cervix, and colon cancer. They provide screening tests to Manitobans and partner with healthcare providers to increase access to cancer screening services across the province. They use letters to invite and remind Manitobans to get screened and notify them of results. They work with healthcare providers to ensure that individuals with abnormal screening results get the follow-up care they need, and provide information and resources to the public and healthcare providers.

critique: The text doesn't say anything about their goal. It says that they want to decrease deaths from breast, cervix, and colon cancer.

critique: It is omitted that CancerCare Manitoba is a healthcare organization in Manitoba.

critique: The answer should mention the privacy of the information.

critique: The answer should mention that some Manitobans might not want to participate in the screening programs.

critique: The answer should mention that the screening programs use personal health information.

critique: The answer omits the use of personal information.

critique: This answer is unnecessarily convoluted. The text states very explicitly how CancerCare Manitoba tries to decrease deaths from breast, cervix, and colon cancer, so stating it more than once doesn't help make this answer any better. The last two sentences also don't particularly add to the answer much. It can be reduced as a complete sentence which provides a nice introduction for CancerCare Manitoba.

critique: The answer should mention that the screening programs use personal information.

question: What does the text say about CancerCare Manitoba's privacy policy?

answer: CancerCare Manitoba's screening programs receive information to know who to invite for screening. The information includes name, address, and date of birth as well as personal health identification number and Manitoba medical number. CancerCare Manitoba's screening programs follow the Manitoba Personal Health Information Act, which means that personal health information is kept private and confidential at all times. All program staff have signed a pledge of confidentiality.

critique: It's omitted that Healthcare Manitoba states that they offer appointments at all sites.

critique: The answer should mention that the screening programs provide this information to Manitoba Health Seniors and Active Living.

critique: The answer should mention the option to opt out.

critique: It's omitted that if you do not want to receive letters from the Screening Programs, you can call 1-855-95-CHECK.

critique: The answer should mention that the PHIA is the Manitoba Personal Health Information Act.


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RAMON CABRERA ARGUELLES, D.D., S.T.L. (born November 12, 1944) was a Filipino cleric who served as Archbishop of the Metropolitan Archdiocese of Lipa in the province of Batangas on the island of Luzon, Philippines from 2004 to 2017. Prior to his appointment as archbishop, he was an auxiliary bishop of the same diocese, appointed to that position on November 26, 1993.

Arguelles first appeared in the news for urging Filipinos to boycott Madonna's concert[1] and for calling for prayers for President Ferdinand Marcos after the latter's burial at the Heroes' Cemetery was permitted by the Supreme Court. On February 2, 2017, Pope Francis accepted his resignation as Archbishop of Lipa and appointed Bishop of Daet Gilbert Garcera as Arguelles' successor.[2]

Biography

Arguelles was ordained a priest on December 21, 1969. Argüelles served as rector of San Carlos Seminary from 1982 to 1986. On November 26, 1993, Pope John Paul II elevated him to the office of bishop, and appointed him titular Bishop of Roscrea.

Arguelles was auxiliary bishop of Manila. Afterwards, he took the administration of the Military Ordinariate of the Philippines. In 2004, he was named Archbishop of Lipa succeeding Gaudencio Rosales, who became Archbishop of Manila in 2003.

Arguelles attended Batangas South Elementary School from grades 1 to 4 (1951–1955) and St. Bridget's College from grade 5 to 2nd year high school (1955–1959). He finished 2nd to 5th year high school at Our Lady of Guadalupe Minor Seminary in Makati City (1959–1963). He studied philosophy (1963–1966) and theology (1966–1970) at the San Carlos Seminary in Makati City.

Arguelles studied for the Bachelor of Sacred Theology and Licentiate in Sacred Theology at the Pontifical University of St. Thomas Aquinas (the Angelicum) in Rome (1972–1976) where he also studied sociology (1974–1976). He studied French at the Universite d'Ete in Paris, France (1973); German at the Goethe Institute, Passau, Germany (Summer 1976); Teresa de Avila at the Centre Spirituel, France (1981–1982); Tertianship at the Nemi Renewal Institute, Rome (July–December 1988); Poustinia at Madonna House, Comberemere, Ontario, Canada (December 1988-February 1989); and apostolic spirituality at St. Bueno's, North Wales (February–May 1989).

Arguelles' priestly ministry began when he served as assistant parish priest at San Jose de Navotas in Navotas City, Metro Manila (1970–1972). He also served at these parishes in Germany: Hoxter 1 Luchtringen (1973–1974); Clemenskirche, Hannover (1975); and Grosskollnbach/Isar (1976).

Arguelles was also former prefect and acting pastor of the Guadalupe Minor Seminary (1977–1978). For three years he was priest-in-charge of the Fil-Mission (Mission Society of the Philippines) Seminary in Tagaytay (1978–1981) where he was also professor of Introduction to the Scriptures. He served as rector of San Carlos Seminary in Makati City (1982–1986) and professor of Spirituality at the Summer Institute (1983–1985). He was parish priest and chaplain at the University of the Philippines in Quezon City (1986–1988) and then became parish priest of Our Lady of Mt. Carmel, Quezon City.

Arguelles served as rector of the Colegio Filipino in Rome (1990–1994) and became chaplain of Filipinos in that country for two years (1990–1992).

Pope John Paul II appointed him an auxiliary bishop for Manila on Nov. 27, 1993 and he was consecrated at St. Peter's Basilica in Rome. He was appointed head of the military ordinariate of the Philippines on Aug. 25, 1995 and served until 2005.

Since 1995, Arguelles has been chairman of the Catholic Bishops' Conference of the Philippines' Episcopal Commission on Migrants and Itinerant Peoples (ECMI). Since 1988 he has been spiritual director of the National Service Committee of the National Charismatic Renewal Movement.

[1] Cinco, Maricar. “Bishop urges boycott of Madonna concert”, _The Inquirer_, San Pedro City, 24 February 2016. Retrieved on 24 February 2016.

[2] http://press.vatican.va/content/salastampa/it/bollettino/pubblico/2017/02/02/0071/00172.html#li

title: Ramon Arguelles

question: What does the text say about Arguelles' education?

answer: Arguelles attended Batangas South Elementary School from grades 1 to 4 (1951-1955) and St. Bridget's College from grade 5 to 2nd year high school (1955-1959). He finished 2nd to 5th year high school at Our Lady of Guadalupe Minor Seminary in Makati City (1959-1963). He studied philosophy (1963-1966) and theology (1966-1970) at the San Carlos Seminary in Makati City. Arguelles studied for the Bachelor of Sacred Theology and Licentiate in Sacred Theology at the Pontifical University of St. Thomas Aquinas (the Angelicum) in Rome (1972-1976) where he also studied sociology (1974-1976). He studied French at the Universite d'Ete in Paris, France (1973); German at the Goethe Institute, Passau, Germany (Summer 1976); Teresa de Avila at the Centre Spirituel, France (1981-1982); Tertianship at the Nemi Renewal Institute, Rome (July-December 1988); Poustinia at Madonna House, Combermere, Ontario, Canada (December 1988-February 1989); and apostolic spirituality at St. Bueno's, North Wales (February-May 1989).

critique: The answer should mention his seminary education.

critique: The answer should mention the seminaries he attended.

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critique: It is irrelevant that he studied philosophy and theology at the San Carlos Seminary in Makati City.

critique: The answer should mention where Arguelles studied for the Bachelor of Sacred Theology and Licentiate in Sacred Theology.

critique: The answer should mention his education in Rome.

question: What does the text say about Arguelles' life as a priest prior to being appointed a bishop?

answer: Arguelles' priestly ministry began when he served as an assistant parish priest at San Jose de Navotas in Navotas City, Metro Manila. He served in Germany at Hoxter 1 Luchtringen, Clemenskirche, and Grosskollnbach/Isar. Arguelles was also a former prefect and acting pastor of the Guadalupe Minor Seminary. He was priest-in-charge of the Fil-Mission (Mission Society of the Philippines) Seminary in Tagaytay. He served as rector at the San Carlos Seminary in Makati City. He was parish priest and chaplain at the University of the Philippines in Quezon City. Arguelles served as rector of the Colegio Filipino in Rome and was chaplain of Filipinos in that country for two years.

critique: "He was priest-in-charge of the Fil-Mission (Mission Society of the Philippines) Seminary in Tagaytay" is irrelevant to the question.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The answer is actually more elaborate than is necessary, however it offers a lot of detail which can help someone who is wanting to know more about Arguelles as a priest. One could edit this to conciser removing some of the details relating to locations etc.

critique: The answer should mention his time as a parish priest.

critique: The answer should mention that he was also a professor.

critique: It's omitted that he was also parish priest of Our Lady of Mt. Carmel, Quezon City.

critique: It is irrelevant that he was prefect and acting pastor of the Guadalupe Minor Seminary, priest-in-charge of the Fil-Mission (Mission Society of the Philippines) Seminary in Tagaytay, and served as rector at the San Carlos Seminary in Makati City.

critique: The answer should mention the parishes he served.

question: What does the text say about Arguelles' family?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that there is no mention of Arguelles' family in the text.

critique: The text does not say anything about Arguelles' family.


text:
Night was quickly approaching, and the doves had already taken to the air. She watched them from her spot by the parkade, and listened to their gentle cooing, and wished that she could be so free, to spread wings and go where the wind would take her.

She had been living in the parkade for over a month now. The doves had followed her all the way from Cliff's Edge, her previous home. She had been forced to leave: winter was far colder by Cliff's Edge, and the snow tended to fall in great white sheets. Her journey had been long and arduous, and the doves had been there every step of the way. She welcomed their company, because it was the only company she had.

A small dove landed on her shoulder and cooed softly in her ear. It ruffled its feathers, then took to the air once again. They had grown accustomed to her, she knew. To them, she was just an oversized dove, wingless and beakless but a friend nonetheless. They never judged her or ridiculed her because of the way she looked, or talked, or lived. They just accepted.

She gazed up wistfully at the Buniard Building and noticed there were a few lights on in some of the apartments. Still early, then. Some of them were probably having supper now: families eating around the dinner table, or couples snuggled warmly infront of the television set, eating their T.V. dinners. The doves were her companions, her family. And the Buniard Building was her television set.

Through it she experienced the lives of its inhabitants. She learned to love some of them, and hate others, and often she caught herself rooting for one member of a family or another, and hoping things would come out right for them in the end. The day Mrs. Parkins suffered a heart attack she had been there, watching in horror, worried and angry at the injustices of life. Tonight Mr. Parkins was alone at home, pacing, clasping his hands tightly behind his back, moving like a caged animal - restless and lonely. Somehow she knew Mrs. Parkins had passed away. Perhaps it was the way he slouched, as though he had given up hope, or the way he had stopped brooding, as though there was nothing left to hope for.

She turned her gaze back to the doves, and saw them painted against a full moon. The moon was larger then she had ever seen it before, and took up a large portion of the night sky - a beacon among the tiny stars, and she was reminded of the story she had read in one of the papers, about a space shuttle that would soon be launched from Cape Canaveral and put the first man on the moon. How ridiculous it seemed, to spend so much money and effort to get to the moon, when there was so much suffering right here on Earth.

A chill wind started to blow. She heard its dismal howl, and watched as it overturned old carton boxes and sent newspapers skittering across the cold cement like mice. A plastic bag rolled down the road, hopping and creeping as though it possessed a life of its own. She started to shiver, and hugged herself tightly. She got up and brought a trash can from the parkade, filled it with the newspapers she had found that day - the Herald and the Boston Globe and the New York Times - and lit a small fire.

Startled by the sudden heat, the doves took to the air, and just when it seemed they would go up to the trees to roost for the night, they returned to her outstretched arms, and pecked at the bread crumbs she held in her hands.

As her gaze drew back to the Buniard Building, she had a strange premonition. Just as she had known that Mrs. Parkins was dead, she knew that something was going to happen tonight. The feeling was vague and far off, like a mirage in the desert, and she wondered if perhaps - and just like the mirage - it was a matter of wishful thinking. Did she want something to happen? Perhaps looking up at the Buniard was not enough, perhaps she longed for something more, something real. Something that would happen to her for a change.

Soon the feeling passed, leaving her cold and tired.

Young Vanessa Lewis was out by her bedroom window, gazing at the sky, and, in another apartment, Mr. Parkins was still pacing restlessly. Vanessa was a strange girl, but one of her favourite people to watch. She was forever arguing with her parents, like teenagers will, and sneaking off in the middle of the night. She spent long hours at her bedroom window, watching the doves, admiring their grace and beauty, not knowing that she herself was being watched.

Time passed, and soon even the sight of the pretty, wistful girl was not enough to keep her interest, and her gaze drifted, as it tended to do, back to the doves. They were acting strangely tonight, moving in short, abrupt movements, taking to the air and then returning, not remaining in one place for too long. Restless, she thought. Maybe they, too, felt that something was going to happen tonight. She would worry about that another time, though. It was getting late.

"Come," she whispered, "we'll find a place to rest this tired body of mine."

The pain in her back had returned with the cold, and she found it difficult to walk. She made her way to the park nearby, the Royal Grand park, a small sign stated, although it was far from royal and hardly what she would call grand. She made her bed in the lush, wet grass, and lay beneath the stars, and waited for sleep to take her. Around her the doves cooed and pawed at her clothing, perhaps looking for a last scrap of bread before they went up to roost.

But she felt restless, and sleep did not come quickly. She sat up and shivered slightly, and her eyes were drawn once again to the Buniard. Something was going to happen tonight. The realisation excited her. It was a warm feeling inside of her, as though a candle had been lit in her belly. Her eyes sparkled with a life she thought she had lost long ago.

And that's when she saw him, silhouette against the night, running. With a violent shudder the warm feeling was ripped from her, and in its place was only dread. Something bad was going to happen tonight. Something unspeakable.

title: The Bird Lady

question: What does the story say about migratory species?

answer: No answer

question: What does the story say about the residents of the Buniard?

answer: The woman watches the residents of the Buniard building, and she loves some of them, and hates others. She watches some of the residents and hopes things will come out right for them. One day, she sees Mrs. Parkins suffer a heart attack. She sees Mr. Parkins pacing restlessly at home, and she knows that Mrs. Parkins has passed away. The woman watches Vanessa Lewis, a strange girl who sneaks out at night and spends long hours at her bedroom window.

critique: The answer is a summary of the entire story, not just the residents of the Buniard.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: It's omitted that the woman watches Mr. Parkins, one of her favorite people to watch.

critique: The answer should mention that Mr. Parkins is pacing restlessly because he's lonely now that his wife has died.

critique: The highlighted portion should be edited to show that the woman watches more than Mrs. Parkins.

critique: The woman watches the residents of the Buniard building, and she loves some of them, and hates others. She watches some of the residents and hopes things will come out right for them. One day, she sees Mrs. Parkins suffer a heart attack. She sees Mr. Parkins pacing restlessly at home, and she knows that Mrs. Parkins has passed away. The woman watches Vanessa Lewis, a strange girl who sneaks out at night and spends long hours at her bedroom window.

text:
-The answer omits that Vanessa Lewis, one of the residents at Buniard Building, was one of the woman's favorite people to watch.
-It also should mention that the bird lady had a strange premonition. Just as she had known that Mrs. Parkins was dead, she knew that something was going to happen tonight.

category: coverage

question: What does the text say about the narrator?

answer: The narrator is a woman who lives in the parkade. She has been living there for over a month. She is wingless and beakless, and the doves see her as one of their own. The doves have followed her from Cliff's Edge, her previous home. She was forced to leave because winter was far colder by Cliff's Edge, and the snow tended to fall in great white sheets. The doves had been there every step of the way, and she welcomed their company because it was the only company she had.

critique: Add the missing details about the narrator: she is homeless and loves the doves.

critique: The narrator is not named and is referred to only as "the Bird Lady".

critique: The narrator is not described as wingless and beakless.

critique: The answer doesn't talk about what thebirds see in the narrator.

critique: The narrator is not described as wingless and beakless; the doves see her as one of their own.

critique: "She is wingless and beakless, and the doves see her as one of their own. The doves have followed her from Cliff's Edge, her previous home. She was forced to leave because winter was far colder by Cliff's Edge, and the snow tended to fall in great white sheets. The doves had been there every step of the way, and she welcomed their company because it was the only company she had." - superfluous information that should be deleted.

text:
-'She is wingless and beakless,...' This doesn't make sense on its own. The model should consider writing it as 'to the doves, the woman was wingless and beakless.'
-'The doves had been there every step of the way, and she welcomed their company because it was the only company she had.' The doves had been where? The model should consider rewriting this.
-The answer omits that the narrator enjoyed watching the tenants of the Buniard Building, whom she became accustomed to.

category: other

category_text: Coherence and coverage.


text:
Back in 2007 I was just a fresh faced 24 year old who had recently returned from backpacking and was ready to gamble my future on a business idea my brother had conjured up. So, instead of getting a ‘proper’ job upon my return, I worked night and day with him to build Sprint Education.

As the business turns 10 years old this year I think it’s the perfect time to take a look back and consider some of the crucial business lessons that we have learned whilst building Sprint Education.

There are many of course, however we are going to focus on the most valuable lessons we’ve learned in the hope that you'll find at least one golden nugget of inspiration that you can apply to your own education business.

So let’s kick off with Lesson #1.

Lesson #1: This may shock you but it is… Sack a problem customer!

[sack a problem customer]

This lesson goes against everything you are taught in business…

_“The customer is always right.”_

But I’ve learned the hard way over the years that this ideology isn’t always correct.

Now firstly, I must state that 99.99% of Sprint Education’s clients are outstanding! They work well with my team and together we strive towards a common goal – to make our client more sales from the education sector. However, as with all companies out there, every blue moon a ‘rogue’ will rise up and cause your business or staff problems.

When I was starting out back in 2007 my belief was that the client was always right, no matter what! But this attitude clouded my take on the reality of some situations.

Then an incident occurred a few years ago which changed my thinking altogether. A new client had sent out an email campaign with us, with part of his email asking schools to click through to a well known video hosting website to watch his video. One teacher, having received the email, called our client to explain that their school’s filtering system did not allow her to access this website so could he send them the video directly to watch.

After speaking with this teacher the client then phoned me up, and for the first and only time in 10 years, he unleashed a torrent of abuse too rude to type in this blog. The client’s issue revolved around his opinion that Sprint Education had the power to alter any school’s web filters across the UK so they could access any website, and why had we not done this before launching the campaign so the school in question could watch his video?

I tried in vain to explain it was impossible for us to alter schools' web filters and that we didn’t possess magic powers to fiddle with other organisations' systems. I explained that website filtering is usually managed internally by a school’s Network Manager and that they alone possessed the power to un-restrict certain websites, not Sprint Education. However, the client refused to believe this was true and continued in his demands for me to alter the school’s website filters.

Two days later the client phoned me back, and having now done his own research he understood that what I had explained was correct, and I was not at fault, and also because he had made several sales from the email he was really happy to book in his next campaign.

The question then hit me, what should I do? Take the money and book in the next campaign, or maintain my company’s self-respect?

Whilst he spoke to me on the phone I thought back to how he had spoken to me in his moment of rage, and I then considered what the greater effects would have been had he spoken not to me, but instead to one of my staff in this way. How would they feel, would it dampen their enthusiasm for working at Sprint Education? It certainly would have been very unpleasant for them!

It was at this point I had my moment of clarity.

I could not let anyone speak to me or my team in such an unprofessional manner, no matter what the reason and how much money they were offering for a new booking. After all, one of my team members is my Mum (and no one would want their Mum spoken to in this way). So I decided it was the right decision to ‘sack’ the client.

As the client was talking, I politely interrupted him and calmly explained that due to how he had handled the previous discussion with me I had taken the decision to not work with him or his company again, that our ideas of a positive working relationship were clearly poles apart, and that I wished him all the best with his education marketing in the future. I left it at that.

Over the years they’ve tried a couple of times to work with us again after the initial campaign generated so many sales for them, but each time I have politely refused their request. It’s a tactic that I’ve reluctantly and rarely had to employ over the years, but sometimes when you get the feeling that a new enquiry is going to turn bad or may have a negative effect on your business, or even your staff’s morale, then trust your gut instinct and pass up the opportunity. You, your team, and even the client will all be much happier in the long term.

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question: What does the text say about how to become a good teacher?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer could include some relevant details from the text.

critique: The question is asking for a response that is not in the text.

critique: The article does not discuss how to become a good teacher.

question: What does the text say about Sprint Education?

answer: Sprint Education is a company that was started by the author and his brother. The company is 10 years old this year. The author and his brother work night and day to build Sprint Education. The company has 99.99% of its clients are outstanding.

critique: It's omitted that the author and his brother had to learn a lesson about sacking problem customers.

critique: The answer could mention the lesson learned from dealing with a difficult client.

critique: The company's age is irrelevant to the question.

critique: The answer should mention the lesson the author learned.

critique: It's omitted that they sell to schools and teach marketing to the education sector.

text: The last sentence should be rephrased

question: What does the text say about Sprint Education's ability to alter its clients' website filtering system?

answer: It is implied that Sprint Education cannot alter its clients' website filtering systems. The Network Manager of a school has the power to un-restrict certain websites.

critique: The answer should mention that the client thought Sprint Education had the power to alter the website filtering system.

critique: The answer should be clearer in its pronoun use.

critique: It's omitted that the company doesn't have the power to alter other organizations' systems.

critique: The answer should mention that the client was angry about this.

critique: Sprint Education does not have the power to change or alter the popularity of a private website.

critique: The answer should be clearer about the limitations of Sprint Education's power.

critique: The answer should mention that the client was angry at Sprint Education for not being able to alter the website filtering system.

question: What does the text say about problem customers?

answer: The author says that problem customers are rare, but they do exist. One of the most valuable lessons the author learned is that a problem customer is not always right. The author says that 99.99% of Sprint Education's clients are outstanding, but every blue moon a "rogue" client will rise up and cause problems. The author says that when a new client is rude or abusive to the author or their staff, they should be sacked.

critique: The author says that they have had to sack a problem customer. The answer should reflect this.

critique: The author says that 99.99% of Sprint Education's clients are outstanding, but every blue moon a "rogue" client will rise up and cause problems. The author says that when a new client is rude or abusive to the author or their staff, they should be sacked.

critique: The author says that they should be sacked, not the client.

critique: The author says that when a new client is rude or abusive to the author or their staff, they should be sacked.

critique: This information is included multiple times in the response.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The answer should mention the specific incident that led the author to this conclusion.

critique: The author says that problem customers are rare, but they do exist. One of the most valuable lessons the author learned is that a problem customer is not always right. The author says that 99.99% of Sprint Education's clients are outstanding, but every blue moon a "rogue" client will rise up and cause problems. The author says that when a new client is rude or abusive to the author or their staff, they should be sacked.


text:
The first day of the revolution was not a happy one.

Many of my neighbors were grey with anxiety as we lined up outside City Hall. It had been less than an hour since the military police had thrown down their weapons and surrendered. About a dozen men emerged from the destroyed police station with their arms raised. None were spared. For many of my friends, it was their first time committing murder. You could see it on their faces. Their lips quivered and their eyes sunk under the weight of their Catholic guilt. Despite all their talk, my friends did not yet have the stomach for murder. But I did.

There are many reasons why I was the de facto leader that day as we marched on City Hall. I had always been vocal dissident. I had lost my family and my farm to the regime. There was an American reporter in the village and I spoke the best English. Despite this, I suspect that I was able to lead because I was the only one in the village who had killed before. The thought makes my mouth go dry, but I fear it is true. Numbness to violence may be all a leader needs.

When we arrived at City Hall, I had the men of the town form an orderly line in front of the building. They stood ready with makeshift weapons; mostly gardening equipment. The men who had not fired a shot at the police station were placed closest to the door. They needed to share the responsibility of the revolution. They needed to taste murder.

The mayor and his staff did not leave the building immediately. My friends and neighbors grew impatient under the Latin American sun that beat down on them. I heard them muttering to each other, “Why don’t we drag them out?” or “Can’t we just burn this building down?” I continued to wait. It would be better this way.

After some time, the mayor emerged. He exited the building alone but, as he closed the doors behind him, we could see his staff waiting inside with terrified faces. I stood closest to the door, away from the ranks of townspeople standing before the building. The mayor dabbed the sweat from his light-brown forehead and approached me. He was dressed in his best clothes. I had forgotten that it was Sunday.

As the fat man came to a stop before me, I addressed him by his fist name, “Good afternoon, Guillermo.”

“And to you, Señor Alvaro,” he replied in a calm, subdued voice.
The only other man near us was the American reporter. He scribbled in his notepad, trying to translate despite his weak grasp on the Spanish language.

“It is a lovely day, isn’t it,” the mayor said, as if to himself.

“They are waiting,” I said, pointing to the crowd.

“They do not look very eager, Señor Alvaro. They seem more afraid than I am.”

“Then I will give them strength. That is what a true leader does.”

“A true leader,” Guillermo said thoughtfully. “Tell me, Señor Alvaro, are there any members of the military police still alive?”

I shook my head.

“Once the capital hears of this, they will burn this village to the ground. No amount of leadership can save you from their army. They will destroy each of those men and their farms. They will rape their wives and slaughter their children.”

“These are desperate times, Guillermo. You have pushed us to this level.”

Guillermo nodded sadly. “I am sorry you think that.” The mayor looked up at the gentle clouds and asked, “Is there any way I could convince you to spare the rest of the men in City Hall?”

I shook my head again.

“I didn’t think so.” Guillermo sighed before speaking again. “Very well. Give me a moment to prepare myself and I will go.”

“The people have waited long enough,” I said. “You go now.”

“You arrogant child,” Guillermo said, looking at me with scorn, “thinking you can command a dead man.”

The mayor looked at the crowd for a few seconds. Nobody spoke. Even the wind was silent.

“Are you ready?” I asked after almost a minute had gone by.

“No,” Guillermo said. “But I will go anyway. I encourage you to spare the rest of the men in City Hall. The army may be more lenient if you make this compromise.”

“There will be no compromise,” I declared with conviction. “Maybe greed has corrupted your judgment, Guillermo, but we will not show compassion for evil men. As long as we fight for a just cause, no army in the world can defeat us. That is something you can never understand.”

He did not look at me with disgust, anger, or disdain. Looking into his eyes, I saw sadness.

“Tanto orgullo,” he said to me. “Te destruirá, hijo.”

Without another word, he walked towards the crowd. The men raised their weapons, but none wanted to take the first swing. The mayor did not slow. It looked as if he would walk right through the crowd. At last, one man brought a shovel down on Guillermo’s head. He fell to one knee as blood shot from the wound. Another man struck him in the side and the mayor was on his back. The mob began to form a circle around him.

“What was the last thing he said?” the American reporter said behind me.

“Such pride,” I said as I watched the bloodlust spread through the crowd. “It will destroy you, child.”

title: Such Pride (<900 words)

question: Describe the reasons the narrator was the de facto leader.

answer: He had always been a vocal dissident. He had lost his family and farm to the regime. He spoke the best English. He was the only one in his village who had killed before.

critique: "The thought makes my mouth go dry, but I fear it is true." is evidence that the narrator is not proud of the fact that he was the only one in the village who had killed before.

critique: The narrator's English skills are irrelevant.

critique: It is omitted that he is the only one with experience of murder.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator is the only one who had killed before.

critique: Does not mention his likely opposition to the suicide culture.

question: What happens when the Mayor emerges?

answer: The Mayor emerges and approaches Alvaro. The Mayor asks Alvaro if there are any members of the military police still alive. Alvaro says no. The Mayor tells Alvaro that the capital will burn the village down. The Mayor asks Alvaro to spare the rest of the men in City Hall. Alvaro says there will be no compromise. The Mayor tells Alvaro that his pride will destroy him. The Mayor is killed.

critique: The order of the last two sentences should be reversed.

critique: The answer should include the theme and quote rather than details of the interactions between Alvaro and the mayor.

critique: The answer is a summary of the story, not a direct response to the question.

critique: The answer is a summary of the whole story. It needs to be re-written.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

question: What causes the narrator's neighbors to be anxious at the beginning?

answer: They are anxious because they have just killed people.

critique: While some people would be tense since they were just involved in a bloody skirmish it does not explain why people were in line outside city hall.

critique: The answer should include that they are anxious about the revolution.

critique: The neighbors are anxious because they are about to kill people.

critique: It is omitted that they are anxious because they have just killed people and they feel guilty.

critique: The answer should mention that the people they killed were military police.

critique: It is omitted that the narrator's neighbors are anxious because they have just killed people and they are not used to it.

question: Describe the setting of the story.

answer: The story is set in Latin America. It is implied that the country is in a state of political upheaval. It is not described in any more detail than that.

critique: "The story is set in Latin America." - is inaccurate because the setting is never mentioned (although it is implied that it is Latin America). The correct answer is "The story takes place during a revolution."

critique: The answer should mention the time period.

critique: The breakdown of political structure is described.

critique: The answer could be more specific about the setting.

critique: The story does not say that the country is in a state of political upheaval.

critique: "It is implied that the country is in a state of political upheaval." - this is inaccurate. The country is in a state of political upheaval because the military police surrendered and the mayor was killed. Revolt was not mentioned.