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When Steve met Her at their usual rendez-vous coffee shop, he had no idea why she had asked him there, but he missed Her and was glad to hear from Her and therefore had agreed to meet Her. Steve didn’t honestly understand the intended purpose of the meeting until thirty minutes had passed since she had departed and he had been sitting in his car with the key in the ignition, but in the ‘off’ position. It was then that Steve realized that Cold had a very distinct smell.

Steve just wasn’t Her type of person.

Or would it be “Her’s type of person”? Steve wasn’t really quite sure about the grammatical ramifications of having a name like Her. They had been together for so long, he and Her, that he no longer thought of Her by her proper name, but instead by the name that his friends had picked up using. “Are you bringing Her?” “Is this yours or is this Her’s?” “Don’t you think about anything besides Her?” That last one was a tricky question, Steve had found, as he did think about things that weren’t Her, but mostly because of Her (Her’s?) influence. He thought about the bands she enjoyed, the movies they’d watched together, and the fact that he hated sleeping/eating/being alone, but those were all related to Her, weren’t they? If he thought of Her as “Her,” did he also have to capitalize “She”? Who thought about this kind of stuff anyways?

But that’s just the type of person Steve is.

When Steve was in 3rd grade, his class had taken a trip to the capitol. The school organizers had decided that the most cost efficient and practical way to transport the 30-some-odd kids 600 miles was to take the Ferry, which would end up being a 3 days/2 nights (one way) journey. Steve’s mom had packed him a sack that contained enough food and clothing to last the 9 days that Steve was to be gone.
The first day on the ferry, the weather was dreadful and the ferry was taking on 6 foot swells. The rocking had excited most of the children, who went out onto the deck to feel the ocean spray, but the motion simply made Steve miss his mother and he decided to curl up with his sack of loving food and clothes at 7:30pm, more than an hour and half before the other children would retire. That night, Steve vomited all over his sack, rendering the food inedible. The next day, Steve, dressed in the clothes of one of his school mates, lived off a diet of complementary saltine crackers provided by the ferry company. On the third day, Steve was feeling quite better and, with a new found sense of confidence, decided to spend all of his mother’s allotted $15 dollars at the ferry restaurant, which gained him a meal of Fruity Pebbles, chocolate milk, cherry yogurt, and 2 packages of Certs, which he promptly threw up within 10 minutes of finishing.

Because that’s the type of person that Steve is.

	Steve had never had particular difficulty getting into relationships with women, as he was genuinely interested in and interesting to other people. The biggest problem for Steve (until Her, of course) was maintaining his interest for more than a few months. The girlfriend before Her was a cute little girl, about three quarters of a foot shorter than Steve, with long, well maintained, nice smelling brown hair. They hung out for five months. They had sex twice. Steve then realized how completely incompatible they were. How could he ever spend any portion of his life with someone who was mildly religious? Or didn’t appreciate the meaningful subtleties of a composition by The Smiths? Besides, Steve had Her on his mind the whole time.

Because that’s the kind of person that Steve was.

	When Steve was still a teenager, Steve would sometimes let go of the wheel of his car and watch as he drifted towards the oncoming traffic. Steve often sat on the roof of his house, smoking cigarettes and daring himself to jump. Steve bit his nails and listened to sad lo-fi bands and cried when he drove long distances and had panic attacks at school and cursed a little bit too much and considered begging his Doctor Mother for a prescription for some sort of anti-depressant or anti-anxiety or anti-something pill or something because anything was better than what Steve felt that he was dealing with.

Because that was just the type of person that Steve was.

	Once, Steve drove 30 miles to visit his biological father. He knocked on his father’s door and, when finding no response, was surprised to learn that the door wasn’t locked at all. Immediately, Steve was returned to that ferry ride, the stench of vomit with a needy feeling and a rocking sensation. Steve found his father face down on his couch, surrounded by cans and bottles of beer. Handles of liquor. Anti-depressants and sleeping aids. There was a unhealthy looking dog tied up in the kitchen that Steve had never seen before who wouldn’t stop barking. Steve sat on the edge of the couch, checked his father’s pulse with two fingers, and then wrote a note that said:

“I love you, dad.”

Steve placed the note in his father’s hand, kissed his dad on the forehead, and left. Steve didn’t go home, though. He drove in the opposite direction until he ran out of gas.

Steve was just that type of person sometimes.

	Steve was still sitting in his car, in the middle of the winter, without the engine on. Steve wondered whether or not the salt content of tears made them freeze at a lower temperature than normal water. Do people who eat a lot of salty foods have saltier tears? What gives someone high blood pressure? Steve asked the ghost that lived in his car what type of person would consider him their type of person. As usual, the phantom didn’t respond. Steve turned on his car. He wondered whether or not he was an optimist. Would an optimist want there to be a heaven? Or would he rather rot in the ground, free for eternity? Steve supposed it really depended on what type of person they had been in their life. Steve asked the ghost whether or not his father had been an optimist. The ghost didn’t respond. Probably, thought Steve.

title: Steve has a lot on his mind.

question: What does the story say about Steve's relationships with women?

answer: Steve has never had a difficult time getting into relationships with women. He has had some trouble maintaining his relationships for more than a few months.

critique: The answer should mention his most recent relationship with Her.

question: What does the story say about why Steve did not enjoy the school trip to the capitol?

answer: Steve's mom packed him a sack with enough food and clothing to last him nine days. The first day on the ferry was dreadful and the ferry was taking on six-foot swells. The rocking made Steve miss his mom and decide to curl up with his sack of loving food and clothes at 7:30 pm. That night, Steve vomited all over his sack and made the food inedible. The next day, Steve dressed in the clothes of one of his school mates and ate complementary saltine crackers provided by the ferry company. On the third day, Steve was feeling quite better and decided to spend all of his mother's allotted $15 dollars at the ferry restaurant, which gained him a meal of Fruity Pebbles, chocolate milk, cherry yogurt, and 2 packages of Certs, which he promptly threw up within ten minutes of finishing.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The answer is a summary of the events that happened on the trip, not the reason why Steve didn't enjoy the trip.

critique: The answer is a summary of the events of the story, not an answer to the question.

critique: The answer is a summary of the events of the story. It should be rewritten to answer the question.

critique: The answer should be re-written for better clarity.

critique: The answer should mention that Steve vomited on the ferry.

critique: It is irrelevant to Steve's school trip to the capitol that his mom had packed him a sack and he became seasick on the ferry. This should be omitted.

critique: The answer is a summary of the events, not the reason why Steve did not enjoy the trip.

question: What does the story say about what kind of person Steve's girlfriend is?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the story does not explicitly say anything about Steve's girlfriend.


split: train

text:
_WESTERN COMICS_ was a Western comic book series published by DC Comics. DC's longest-running Western title, it published 85 issues from 1948 to 1961.[1] _Western Comics_ was an anthology series, featuring such characters as the wandering cowboy the Wyoming Kid, the Native American lawman Pow Wow Smith, the Cowboy Marshal, Jim Sawyer, showman Rodeo Rick, and Matt Savage, Trail Boss.[2] The masked Vigilante Greg Saunders appeared in the first four issues of the title, but was soon replaced by itinerant fix-it man Nighthawk.

Notable contributors included writers Don Cameron, Gardner Fox, and France Herron; and artists Carmine Infantino, Gil Kane, Howard Sherman, and Leonard Starr.

Publication history

Whitney Ellsworth edited the book for most of its run, assisted by Julius Schwartz, who took over the editorial reins for the last two years. Originally featuring four or more stories per issue, by issue #70 (July/Aug. 1958), _Western Comics_ reduced the number of stories to three.[3] _Western Comics_' infrequently appearing letter column was titled “The Hitching Post.”

Recurring features

-   WYOMING KID: Co-created by Jack Schiff and Howard Sherman, Bill Polk is a cowboy wandering the West looking for his father's murderer. Bill, with his horse Racer, improves his gunfighting skills while working as a ranch hand, rodeo rider, army scout, and so on, finally bringing the murderer to justice.[4] A good-natured hero, the Wyoming Kid appeared in every issue of _Western Comics_, often featured on the cover in early issues. He was so popular in _Western Comics_ that his adventures were also chronicled in _World's Finest Comics_ from 1949 – 1953.
-   POW WOW SMITH: Moving over from _Detective Comics_, the character first appeared in _Western Comics_ issue #43 (Jan./Feb. 1954), at that point becoming a principal figure, often appearing on the cover. He appeared in every issue from #43 to the end of the title's run.
-   NIGHTHAWK: Masked cowboy Hannibal Hawkes appeared in every issue of _Western Comics_ from #5 (Sept./Oct. 1948) – #76 (July/Aug. 1959)
-   RODEO RICK — Co-created by artist Howard Post, Rick and his horse Comet's adventures were later chronicled by writers Gardner Fox and France Herron, and artists Jimmy Thompson, Ramona Fradon, and Tom Cooke. Rick was featured in most issues of _Western Comics_ from #1 – #69 (May/Jun 1958). For a short time in later issues, he wore a disguise and was known as “The Masked Raider.”[5]
-   COWBOY MARSHAL, JIM SAWYER — the Cowboy Marshal was featured in every issue of the title from #1 – #42 (Nov./Dec. 1953).
-   MATT SAVAGE, TRAIL BOSS — created by Gardner Fox, Gil Kane, and Joe Giella, the character was a late addition to _Western Comics_ (taking Nighthawk's slot)[6] in issue #77 (Sept./Oct. 1959), but was the title's cover feature until the end. It was later established that Matt was Scalphunter's father, and was also related to Lt. Steve Savage, the World War I pilot briefly featured in _All-American Men of War_.[7]

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[3] Markstein, Don. “Rodeo Rick,” Don Markstein's Toonopedia. Accessed Aug. 13, 2011. Archived from the original on March 5, 2015.

[4] Markstein, Don. “The Wyoming Kid,” Don Markstein's Toonopedia. Accessed Aug. 13, 2011. Archived from the original on March 5, 2015.

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[6] Markstein, Don. “Matt Savage, Trail Boss,” Don Markstein's Toonopedia. Accessed Aug. 13, 2011. Archived from the original on March 5, 2015.

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title: Western Comics

question: Summarize everything that's dated in the 1950s.

answer: Two characters, Pow Wow Smith and Rodeo Rick, were created during the 1950s. Over the 1950s, the Cowboy Marshal, Jim Sawyer, Matt Savage, and Nighthawk were all prominent characters in the comic. The Cowboy Marshal was first in the series, Matt Savage was added in the late 1950s, and Nighthawk was present from the late '40s to early 1960s.

critique: The Cowboy Marshal was first in the series, Matt Savage was added in the late 1950s, and Nighthawk was present from the late '40s to early 1960s. - the answer is incorrect.

critique: The character of Nighthawk is described as taking the reins in mid-century

critique: "The Cowboy Marshal was first in the series, Matt Savage was added in the late 1950s, and Nighthawk was present from the late '40s to early 1960s." - these are inaccurate. The Cowboy Marshal was the first in the series, Matt Savage was added in the late 1950s, and Nighthawk was present from 1948 to 1959.

critique: The Cowboy Marshal was first in the series in the late 1940s, not the 1950s.

critique: The Cowboy Marshal was first in the series, Matt Savage was added in the late 1950s, and Nighthawk was present from the late '40s to early 1960s. - this is irrelevant and should be removed.

critique: Rodeo Rick was created in the late 1940s.

question: Summarize the publication history.

answer: The comic book series was published by DC Comics. It was their longest-running Western title, publishing 85 issues from 1948 to 1961. The series was an anthology, featuring such characters as the Wyoming Kid, Pow Wow Smith, the Cowboy Marshal, Jim Sawyer, Rodeo Rick, and Matt Savage. Whitney Ellsworth edited the book for most of its run, assisted by Julius Schwartz, who took over the editorial reins for the last two years. The series reduced the number of stories from four or more to three by issue #70.

critique: "whom took over" - is grammatical wrong. Change "whom" to "who"

critique: It's omitted that the series infrequently appeared letter column was titled "The Hitching Post".

critique: There is no evidence that the series reduced the number of stories from four or more to three.

critique: The series reduced the number of stories from four or more to three by issue #70.

critique: The last sentence is confusing and it would be better to omit it.

critique: The series reduced the number of stories to three by issue #70.

question: What does the text say about Whitney Ellsworth's opinions?

answer: No answer

critique: The text does not say anything about Ellsworth's opinions.

question: What does the text say about cowboys?

answer: DC Comics' longest-running Western title, Western Comics, was an anthology series featuring such characters as the wandering cowboy the Wyoming Kid, the Native American lawman Pow Wow Smith, the Cowboy Marshal, Jim Sawyer, Rodeo Rick, and Matt Savage, Trail Boss. The Wyoming Kid, an good-natured hero, appeared in every issue of Western Comics.

critique: The answer should mention that the Wyoming Kid was created by Jack Schiff and Howard Sherman.

critique: The answer should mention the Cowboy Marshal and Jim Sawyer.

critique: The Wyoming Kid is not the only cowboy in the series.

critique: There are several mentions of cowboys in the text, and they should be reflected in the answer.

critique: The answer should mention the Cowboy Marshal.


text:
This is my first short story. Initial apologies for grammar errors. I mainly write for SEO and product descriptions, but have a passion for fiction I want to get out. Here is my first work. Comment with anything that compels you.

Morning Scars

She stared in the mirror to look at her scars, a dark morning ritual. Like a repaired rag-doll, her body seemed to be covered with seems and discoloration, the places where the wounds once existed. Although she is no longer bleeding, the marks are still visible in the morning bathroom light. The sunlight breaking through the half drawn shades, enough to see the speckles of dust particles floating as if they just woke up themselves, floating without purpose. Soon it will be time to face the world. She won't let them see the old, but not forgotten gashes and puncture marks. Some mornings she feels like a war-torn veteran, but never having seen a battlefield or held a weapon.

The hot water stings her back, but helps her body make the final exit from the perils of her dreams, to the reality that is life. Steam enters her nostrils and fills her lungs with warm, moist air. Some mornings this breath almost hurts, from a night of red-eyes and short scuttled breaths; her strength always pushed her beyond that initial breath, to take the next and eventually have the warmth pass through her entire body.

Standing with a towel wrapped around her waist, the foggy mirror almost hid all of her marks. The faint shadowy woman could have been a model or a famous actress whom people adored. As the steam settled, the model would melt away and reveal the reality that existed right in front of her.

She would not weep today, make up brush in hand. She covers her flaws, just as she always does. No one knows they are there. Hidden beneath layers of coverup, she prepares for her day. Sometimes a lonesome teardrop would cause her to wipe-away and reapply some powder or eyeliner. Other times her eyes would well up and the smallest amount of mascara would dissolve under a blink, burning. The sting reminded her she could still feel, she was still human.

A noise in the bedroom signaled he was awake, her husband, the man who wielded the weapons to cause her scars. He wasn't a bad man, he just was put in bad situations. She didn't think he meant to do those things, but he did and she could see the evidence in the mirror.

Children's' laughs and Mickey Mouse cartoons caused a small lift in the sides of her lips, someone could have said it was a smile, others might have brushed it off as a twitch, an involuntary muscle movement. She was still alive, she still had her emotions, she still could laugh. Couldn't she?

The bathroom door opened and creaked slightly, the show must go on. She smiled and said good morning; just in time, as she could see all of her scars and bruises were hidden.

Her husband undressed and prepared to clean up for his day, there was enough hot water for his brief rushed shower. He smiled and offered his morning pleasantries; a laugh was even shared as he dropped the shampoo bottle on his big toe. Looking up though, he knew something was unsettled. For the first time, he saw something. Was it a blemish? Did she get hurt? Under her left eye he could see the swelling. He had never seen that before, how could she have possibly gotten that?

He asked, and the answer knocked him back. Even though he was mostly dry now, its as if the cool air just hit him after stepping out of the shower. As she explained, her scars appeared, one by one transforming from the inside to the out, like he was just given glasses and could finally see clearly.

He had given her those scars, even though he never physically hurt her. There were never any fists or weapons, but she bled.

As he saw his bride transform into the scar-laden woman, he wept. Tears seemed to come from a deep well that was never tapped before. He looked at his hands and they looked burned; his arms and chest and legs bore the same once burned flesh. She saw it as well, face of a man who seemed to have been set in a blazing fire time and again.

They embraces each other, each scar and mark touched on their bodies. They seemed to wince has their pain-ridden scars touched each other. Something seemed to heal, the need to hide their blemishes. Barren, nude and vulnerable they stood. Scars don't heal quickly, but they fade. They loved each other despite the marks left behind, they only knew there was one way to heal them. They needed each other to dab the wounds, one by one until they were gone. A new oath and promise was made, but it was hard to accept.

Each morning she woke up, looked in the mirror at her scarred face. Sometimes one has faded away, and she smiles. He touches her back and she feels a smooth soft hand again, the one she held on the day they took their vows. She was happy to not have to hide anymore, she was happy to see her beauty return a little bit each time she opened her eyes and looked in the sunlit morning mirror. The dust floated in the air, and this time she envisioned it was them, dancing with purpose and love.

title: [RO/MF] My first short story: Morning Scars

question: What did the scars on the wife exemplify?

answer: The scars on the wife exemplified the wounds that she had received from her husband.

critique: The scars represented the wounds she received from her husband, but it's not stated that they exemplified the wounds she received from her husband.

critique: The scars were not from her husband, but from his actions.

critique: The scars are not just from her husband.

critique: The scars are not just from her husband, they are from the situations he has put her in.

critique: The scars were not from her husband, but from his job.

critique: The scars are mostly remnants of beatings. Clearly the husband isstrous, but it is also indisputable that she was professionally assaulted.

text: As based on the lines "He had given her those scars, even though he never physically hurt her. There were never any fists or weapons, but she bled.", it appears that the interpretation that they were 'wounds received from the husband' shows that only the first part of the narrative has been taken into context -where the story makes the reader make this initial assumption before the narrative delves into something deeper. While the narrative is not clear on the context, the response should reflect that there there is lot of symbolism in play.

category: accuracy

question: Describe how the couple started to heal.

answer: The husband saw the scars on his wife and felt empathy. They both embraced and felt their pain. The husband promised to help her and they promised to help each other so that their wounds could heal.

critique: The answer should mention that the couple made a new oath.

critique: The answer omits that they embraced each other.

critique: The answer should mention that the couple embraced and touched each other's scars.

critique: "The husband saw the scars on his wife and felt empathy" - this is actually the wife who sees her scars when she takes a shower. Rewrite the first sentence.

critique: The husband doesn't feel empathy, he feels guilt.

critique: They could have healed from the beginning. It's not stated that they started to heal.

critique: "The husband saw the scars on his wife and felt empathy." - the husband was already aware of the scars and felt empathy. Replace with "The husband saw his wife's scars for the first time and felt empathy."

question: Would the girl in the story be hurt again?

answer: It is implied that she would.

critique: The answer is not implied. The story ends with the couple promising to heal each other, which implies that they will not be hurt again.

critique: The answer is a bit of a stretch. It is also not stated.

critique: It is not implied that she would be hurt again.

critique: There is no implication that the girl would be hurt again.


text:
[Parua Bay wharf] PARUA BAY is a locality and bay on the northern side of the Whangarei Harbour in Northland, New Zealand. Whangarei is 19 km to the west, and Whangarei Heads are 10 km to the south east, with Munro Bay between the two. The western head is called Manganese Point, and the eastern is Reserve Point. The Nook is a small bay just to the north of Reserve Point.[1][2]

The bay is sheltered and about 4 km wide, with about one kilometer between the headlands. The central bay has deep water, but there are wide intertidal zones around the coast. Motukiore Island is just inside Manganese Point and joined to it by a causeway at low tide, although the only practical access is by water. The contours of a defensive pā on the island are still clearly visible.[3]

Solomon's Point divides the bay into two. The point is named after the Māori chief Horomona-Kaikou.[4]

History

Raro-ngaua was a pā on the eastern side of the Parua Bay entrance in the early 19th century. In 1821 or 1822, this pā was attacked by a group of Ngāti Paoa and Waikato warriors, as part of the Musket Wars.[5]

In 1838, Thomas Stewart Scott and two partners bought land on the western side of the bay and set up a shipbuilding yard. The _Governor Fitzroy_, a schooner of about , was one of the ships built here. Manganese ore lay in lumps on the point to the south of the shipyard, then known as Te Waro but now called Manganese Point. The ore was sold in 1844.[6] In 1849, a hydrographic survey was made of Whangarei Harbour by Captain Lort Stokes in the paddle-steamer HMS _Acheron_. He named Parua Bay “Bad Maori Bay” and Manganese Point “Annoyance Point”.[7]

By the mid-1850s, there were four European families living in a small settlement on the western side of the bay.[8] The Government purchased at Parua Bay in 1858, and the land was subsequently settled by people mostly under the “Forty Acre Scheme” which gave a parcel of to any settler older than 18 years, subject to a few conditions.[9]

An Irish surveyor called James Irwin Wilson settled in the Nook in 1858, and fell in love with Joanna Munro, the daughter of a Nova Scotian settler from Munro Bay. Her father, John Munro, was unhappy that Wilson had bought land that he wanted, and opposed their union. The pair tried to elope but were caught. A second elopement was successful and they married in Auckland. John Munro eventually accepted the marriage, and one of James' brothers later married Joanna's sister.[10][11]

Demographics

The statistical area of Parua Bay, which at 39 square kilometres is larger than the locality, had a population of 2,460 at the 2018 New Zealand census, an increase of 447 people (22.2%) since the 2013 census, and an increase of 534 people (27.7%) since the 2006 census. There were 918 households. There were 1,221 males and 1,239 females, giving a sex ratio of 0.99 males per female. Of the total population, 471 people (19.1%) were aged up to 15 years, 231 (9.4%) were 15 to 29, 1,152 (46.8%) were 30 to 64, and 606 (24.6%) were 65 or older. Figures may not add up to the total due to rounding.

Ethnicities were 90.4% European/Pākehā, 15.1% Māori, 2.0% Pacific peoples, 2.6% Asian, and 1.7% other ethnicities. People may identify with more than one ethnicity.

The percentage of people born overseas was 25.0, compared with 27.1% nationally.

Although some people objected to giving their religion, 59.5% had no religion, 29.6% were Christian, and 3.5% had other religions.

Of those at least 15 years old, 510 (25.6%) people had a bachelor or higher degree, and 294 (14.8%) people had no formal qualifications. The median income was $35,900. The employment status of those at least 15 was that 894 (44.9%) people were employed full-time, 300 (15.1%) were part-time, and 63 (3.2%) were unemployed.[12]

Education

Parua Bay School is a coeducational full primary (years 1-8) school with a roll of students as of [13]

Notes

Category:Whangarei District Category:Populated places in the Northland Region

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[6] Pickmere, pp 25-26

[7] Pickmere, pp 119-120

[8] Pickmere, p 50

[9] Pickmere, pp 68-9, 78

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[11] Pickmere, p 78

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title: Parua Bay

question: Summarize everything relating to conflict.

answer: In the early 19th century, Raro-ngaua, a pa on the eastern side of Parua Bay, was attacked by a group of Ngati Paoa and Waikato warriors as part of the Musket Wars in 1821 or 1822. In 1838, Scott and two partners set up a shipbuilding yard on the western side of Parua bay, where Manganese ore lay in lumps by 1843. The ore was sold in 1844. In 1849, the Bay got its current name when Captain Lort Stokes made a hydrographic survey and named it Bad Maori Bay and Manganese Point "Annoyance Point".

critique: The answer omits the conflict between James Irwin Wilson and John Munro.

critique: There is no evidence that the bay's name was given in 1849.

critique: "In 1838, Scott and two partners set up a shipbuilding yard on the western side of Parua bay" is not relevant to conflict.

critique: The conflict in the 19th century is irrelevant to the question.

critique: The conflict between Scott and Munro is irrelevant.

question: Summarize everything relating to the geography of Parua Bay.

answer: Parua Bay is on the northern side of the Whangarei Harbour in New Zealand and is about 4km wide. The bay is sheltered and has a deep central bay, but wide intertidal zones around its coasts. Solomon's Point divides the bay into two. The bay was once known as Bad Māori Bay, but is now just considered a bay. The west side is settled during the mid-1850s, and there is a school there. The western head is called Manganese Point, and the eastern is called Reserve Point.

critique: The last two lines are irrelevant to the question.

critique: Nothing in the article indicates that "the bay was once known as Bad Māori Bay," so this should be omitted.

critique: This point is irrelevant to the question and could be omitted.

text: The last three sentences are irrelevant.

category: coherence

refinement: Parua Bay is on the northern side of the Whangarei Harbour in New Zealand and is about 4km wide. The bay is sheltered and has a deep central bay, but wide intertidal zones around its coasts. Solomon's Point divides the bay into two. The bay was once known as Bad Māori Bay, but is now just considered a bay. The west side is settled during the mid-1850s, and there is a school there. The western head is called Manganese Point, and the eastern is called Reserve Point.

question: What does the article say about the motivation behind the Musket Wars?

answer: No answer

critique: The article does not mention the motivation behind the Musket Wars.

critique: The response is incorrect and does not answer the question.

critique: The answer should mention the Musket Wars.


text:
               They sat together on the corner of College and Fell, casually downing a plate of fries. This was their sixth date together and she was starting to really like him. She was beginning to feel comfortable and natural around him and even his weirdness was starting to grow on her.

                He was starting to like her too, but there were some things about her that bothered him. Mainly,  that apart from her intelligence and personality, she was very plain looking and lead a very plain life. Zoning out from the conversation,  he toyed with the idea that  he could possibly change this about her. He wanted desperately to transform her into the girl of his dreams, the girl he rightfully deserved.

              Zack was looking at her in that way again. She hated when he did this. There was a sense of longing and  unfulfillment whenever he gazed at her this way with his cute brown eyes.

"I can't believe the audacity of my sister," she said, trying to snap him out of his trance.

            Zack took a moment from his day-dream, popped a fry in his mouth and lazily inquired, "Oh? What'd she do this time?"

           Mindy, having partly made up the statement based on an insignificant event that she didn't care to go into detail  on, realized that she had broken his semi-disturbing stare, and said, "Well um, nothing really, just little things."

             "Ah, little things again," said Zack, "it's always just little things." His eyes reflected dissatisfaction again.

"Zack, why do you always look at me that way? You know I don't like it."

            After a brief pause and a well-timed sigh, he said, "Mindy, do you ever wonder that your life will pass by and you'll find yourself married with three kids and wanting youth back?"

"I dunno know, that kind of sounds nice to me..."

           "And there lies your problem, I'm dreadfully afraid of this predicament and you're welcoming of it."

"Are you mad at me Zack?"

"I'm not mad at you Mindy, just your plainness."

          Mindy was taken back by this statement and didn't quite know how to respond, so she just sat and daintily dipped a fry into catsup.

         "I didn't mean it harshly, I mean you have a great personality and all. I mean you realize you're plain don't you?"

She still sat in silence.

"But Mindy, baby, I think we can change this."

           Mindy was offended, but a little curious and kept an ear tuned in to what he was saying. The words he said made her believe that deep down inside she really was plain.

"What if we did something dangerous?"

          He tried to coax a reaction out of her, but she was determined to remain still at this time.

         "You see," Zack said, "the problemo with common criminals these days are that they're usually dumb as a box of rocks. They're all stupid thugs. And that's where we come in. Mindy, we're both intelligent powerful individuals. Just Imagine what we could."

         "You're crazy, absolutely  insane!" She felt obligated to say this because that's what she figured you were supposed to say in scenarios like this, but she really was intrigued.

         "We could be the next Bonnie and Clyde, the perfect Pumpkin and Honey Bunny," he proposed. He saw a gleam of interest in her eye and smiled with delight. Yes, she would be the perfect girl to change and he knew that he had a grasp on her.

         "What would we even do?" She tried to sound like she had posed the question out of shock. She didn't like it one bit, but the idea of being a villain was growing rapidly on her.

        "I was just thinking about that. You know how you always talk about your sister and how unfairly you are treated in comparison to her."

         "Yes." She had to admit, if there was something that bugged her the most, it was how everyone always seemed to favor and praise her sister. Their mother had left Mindy pittance and her sister the family estate, fortune, and her beautiful diamond necklace. Their mother knew how much Mindy loved the necklace and Mindy was convinced that her mother giving it to her sister was an act of sheer spite.

        "Well don't be offended when I say this, but what if we killed her," Zack said, making a gun shape with his hand and mouthing the word "BANG".

          Mindy gasped. She couldn't believe these words were actually coming out of his mouth and yet she loved them.

"Mindy, you know you want this."

She knew.

       "Zack, you don't know what you're doing to me," but he knew. He knew exactly what he was doing to her.

A single hot tear ran down her cheek.

       It was very similar to the tear that ran down her cheek when they drove to Zack's house and grabbed his revolver.

       It was very similar to the tear that ran down her cheek when they drove to her family estate that her sister was living in and broke down the back door.

      It was very similar to the tear that ran down her cheek when she pulled the trigger and her sister's corpse crumpled to the floor.

      And it was very similar to the tear that ran down her cheek when she took off the diamond necklace from her sister's body and fastened to around her neck.

Zack had changed her. He was very pleased with the results

title: Wrote a short story for creative writing: Twist Me

question: How does Zack plan to improve Mindy's plain looks and plain life?

answer: He plans to turn her into a badass criminal (the next Bonnie and Clyde, the next Pumpkin and Honey Bunny).

critique: He also wants to have her wear his sister's necklace.

critique: The answer should be more specific about the criminal activities Zack plans to do with Mindy.

critique: The answer should mention the main plot, i.e., murder.

critique: The answer should mention that he wants to turn her into a beautiful woman.

critique: Zack plans to turn her into Bonnie and Clyde.

critique: The answer should mention that he plans to kill her sister.

critique: The answer should mention that he wants to kill her sister.

critique: He's not against becoming criminals, but rather the means necessary to grant Mindy a sleeker look and life.

critique: The answer should mention the murder of her sister.

critique: Bonnie and Clyde were outlaws, not criminals.

critique: Zack is not the one who commits the crime, he just plans it.

critique: He explicitly tells Mindy that he wants to kill her sister so they can have her fortune. Include this in the list of plans.

critique: Mindy does not want to become a badass criminal

critique: Bonnie and Clyde are the wrong characters to compare them to, since they were the ones who were killed.

critique: The answer should touch on why Mindy is displeased with her life.

question: Why is Mindy open to the idea of killing her sister?

answer: She seems to be jealous of her sister's favorable qualities. She also seems to be anxious to be rid of her plainness, whether on her own or with the help of her new boyfriend by any means necessary.

critique: The reason Zack gives Mindy to kill her sister is that he thinks she's plain and doesn't deserve to be her sister.

critique: The answer should clarify that Mindy's desire to kill her sister is to be with Zack.

critique: This answer does not actually answer the question and should be re-written.

critique: There is no evidence to suggest that she is anxious to be rid of her plainness.

critique: The story does not mention anything about Mindy being jealous of her sister.

critique: Doesn't really answer the question I think you're trying to answer.

critique: The answer should mention that Mindy is also jealous of her sister's inheritance.

critique: It is omitted that Mindy's sister always gets the praise and Mindy gets the pittance.

critique: The line about getting rid of her plainness is quite clunky.

critique: The answer should mention that she is also jealous of her sister's inheritance.

critique:
"Zack, you don't know what you're doing to me," but he knew. He knew exactly what he was doing to her.

A single hot tear ran down her cheek.

It was very similar to the tear that ran down her cheek when they drove to Zack's house and grabbed his revolver.

It was very similar to the tear that ran down her cheek when they drove to her family estate that her sister was living in and broke down the back door.

It was very similar to the tear that ran down her cheek when she pulled the trigger and her sister's corpse crumpled to the floor.

And it was very similar to the tear that ran down her cheek when she took off the diamond necklace from her sister's body and fastened to around her neck.

Zack had changed her. He was very pleased with the results

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question: Why did Mindy's mother leave everything to her sister?

answer: This information can't be found.

critique: It can be implied that it was because her sister was more beautiful than her.

critique: It is implied that Mindy's mother favored her sister.

critique: Mindy's mother left everything to her sister presumably because she favored her more.

critique: There is a mention of Mindy's mother favoring her sister.

critique: It is implied that Mindy's mother left everything to her sister because she favored her.

critique: However, her mother favoring another child would explain why the necklace was given to another child.

critique: It is implied that she believed Mindy would not appreciate it.

critique: It is implied that Mindy's mother was spiteful.

critique: The story says it was because she loved Mindy less.


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TREVOR JOHN SCOTT (born August 30, 1984) is a former American football defensive end who played in the National Football League (NFL). He played college football at Buffalo and was drafted by the Oakland Raiders in the sixth round of the 2008 NFL Draft.

Early years

Scott was twice an All-Northern selection at his high school Potsdam High playing tight end and outside linebacker. He earned two letters and was twice a captain and was team MVP as both a junior and senior and was a Watertown Daily Times First-team selection. He also earned four letters in track and field and two in basketball.

College career

At the University at Buffalo, Scott was an All-Conference selection as a senior he started all 12 games at left end for the Bulls had 10 sacks, 46 tackles and 15 tackles for a loss. In 2006, as a junior, he started all 12 games at defensive end and led the Bulls with nine sacks on the season and also recorded 45 total tackles. In 2005, he played in seven games as a reserve tight end and had eight catches for 55 yards on the season. The prior season, 2004, he played in 10 games after being a redshirt in 2003.

Professional career

Played the 2012 season with the New England Patriots and recorded 3 sacks, 5 tackles, and a forced fumble.

Pre-draft

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Oakland Raiders

[Scott in November 2008] He was a 6th round pick (169th overall) in the 2008 NFL Draft. Scott recorded his first and second career NFL sack on October 19, 2008 when he brought down Brett Favre. That performance earned him a nomination for the NFL Rookie of the Week award, but the award was given to Chris Johnson. Scott finished the 2008 season with 24 tackles, a forced fumble, and tied two others for the most sacks by a rookie with 5.0.

On, November 25, 2010, Scott was placed on injured reserve by the Raiders, due to an injured anterior cruciate ligament in his left knee, ending his season after 10 games, 22 tackles, and 1.5 sacks. He played in all 16 games the following season.

New England Patriots

Scott signed with the New England Patriots on March 17, 2012.[1]

Tampa Bay Buccaneers

Scott signed with the Tampa Bay Buccaneers on August 20, 2013.[2]

Chicago Bears

Scott was signed by the Chicago Bears on March 6, 2014.[3]

Personal life

Scott Is Married to Dana Scott they have a son Jack Christopher Scott Born 11/2014

[1] Schefter: Scott agrees with Pats

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title: Trevor Scott

question: What does the text say about Trevor Scott's college years?

answer: Trevor Scott was an All-Conference selection as a senior in college. He started all 12 games at left end for the Bulls and had 10 sacks, 46 tackles, and 15 tackles for a loss. In 2006, he was also a senior, started all 12 games at defensive end, and he led the Bulls with nine sacks on the season. In 2005, he played in seven games as a reserve tight end and had eight catches for 55 yards on the season. During his junior year, he played in 12 games and had 45 tackles.

critique: The answer should mention that he was a redshirt in 2003.

critique: The answer should mention his college career as a whole.

critique: The 2005 season is not relevant to the question.

critique: It's omitted that he was a redshirt in 2003.


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_THE NEW BACKWARDS_ is an album by Coil released on 18 April 2008. The album is reworked from the _Backwards_ demo, which was originally created for Nothing Records.

Background

_The New Backwards_ was produced by Peter Christopherson and Danny Hyde, and is reworked from the _Backwards_ demo, which was submitted to Torso Records in 1993 and then further recorded at Trent Reznor's Nothing Studios in New Orleans, Louisiana, in the mid-1990s for a planned release on Reznor's Nothing Records imprint on major label Interscope Records. The record was made in Bangkok in 2007.[1]

The album was originally released on 12" vinyl as part of a box set reissue of the album _The Ape of Naples_.[2] It is currently available on 12" vinyl, compact disc, and downloads in FLAC, aac, and mp3 formats.

Track listing

CD, FLAC, aac, mp3

1.  “Careful What You Wish For” - 9:06
2.  “AYOR” - 7:40
3.  “Nature Is a Language” - 8:00
4.  “Fire of the Green Dragon” - 7:54
5.  “Algerian Basses” - 5:02
6.  “Copacaballa” - 6:50
7.  “Paint Me as a Dead Soul” - 6:31
8.  “Backwards” - 5:22
9.  “Princess Margaret's Man in the D'jamalfna” - 8:45

12" vinyl

-   This is the fourth LP in the four record _The Ape of Naples_ box set.

SIDE G

1.  “Careful What You Wish For” - 9:07
2.  “Nature Is a Language” - 8:00
3.  “Algerian Basses” - 5:02

SIDE H

1.  “Copacabbala” - 6:49
2.  “Paint Me as a Dead Soul” - 6:29
3.  “Princess Margaret's Man in the D'Jamalfna” - 8:46

Backwards demo

_Backwards_ was a studio bootleg recording by Coil. The origin of the source of “Backwards” is believed to have been a leak of the studio demo, in the form of a cassette.[3] However, the entire demo was broadcast when Dutch Radio4, a radio station in Amsterdam, had Coil as in-studio guests to coincide with a live performance on 1 June 2001. The program was broadcast on 18 June 2001 and a four-disc CD-R set of the entire broadcast, made by the radio station, was released in an unknown quantity as _Dutch Radio4 Supplement_. Although part of the proposed album was eventually released as _The Ape of Naples_, the material is so augmented that there are very few recognizable samples.

The proposed release on Nothing Records was continuously put off. _The Ape of Naples_ is considered to be the reincarnation of a demo,[4] as it featured completely reworked versions of “Heaven's Blade”, “AYOR” and other songs that are believed to have been originally created around the time of _Backwards_.

“Bee Has Photos” and “Egyptian Basses” are not considered to be officially part of this bootleg as they were released as part of the _Songs of the Week_ download series and not on the supposed original demo.[5] However, the version from _Songs of the Week_ is an alternate version, much shorter in length.

On the live Coil album _Live Three_, a song called “Backwards” is performed. This song is an incarnation of the songs “Simenon” and “Bee Has Photos”.

This bootleg comprises the material for an album with several proposed titles, such as _International Dark Skies_,[6] _God Please Fuck My Mind for Good_, _Fire of the Mind_,[7] _The World Ended a Long Time Ago_[8] and _Backwards_.[9] Other proposed titles are also possibly referenced by this material.

Track listing

1.  “Heaven's Blade” – 7:23
2.  “Wir-Click-Wir” – 6:21
3.  “Elves” – 3:10
4.  “Simenon” – 3:49
5.  “In My Blood” – 3:52
6.  “Spastiche” – 3:09
7.  “Crumb Time” – 4:33
8.  “March of Time” – 6:03

Three extra tracks, “Bee Has the Photos”, “Egyptian Basses” and a different version of “Spastiche”, have been circulated with the demos.

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title: The New Backwards

question: What does the text say about the production of The New Backwards album?

answer: The album was produced by Peter Christopherson and Danny Hyde. It was reworked from the Backwards demo, which was originally created for Nothing Records. The demo was submitted to Torso Records in 1993 and then further recorded at Trent Reznor's Nothing Studios in New Orleans, Louisiana, in the mid-1990s for a planned release on Reznor's Nothing Records imprint on major label Interscope Records. The record was made in Bangkok in 2007.

critique: The answer would be clearer if it omitted the details of the demo.


text:
An earthquake occurred in northern Afghanistan on 30 May 1998, at 06:22 UTC in the Takhar Province with a moment magnitude of 6.5 and a maximum Mercalli intensity of VII (_Very strong_). At the time, the Afghan Civil War was underway; the affected area was controlled by the United Islamic Front for the Salvation of Afghanistan (the “Northern Alliance”).[1]

Overview

This was the second large earthquake in the area in 1998 after another earthquake on February 4.[2] Between 4,000–4,500 people died in Takhar and Badakhshan provinces.[3][4][5] Nearly 7,000 families were affected and estimated 16,000 houses were destroyed or damaged.[6] Approximately 45,000 people became homeless.[7] More than 30 villages were destroyed and another 70 were severely damaged.[8] Several thousand animals were killed and crops and infrastructure were destroyed.[9]

Like many other poorer developing nations, Afghanistan was ill-equipped to face this kind of natural disaster.[10] The country had no forms of protection or hazard micronization.[11] Houses were mainly built of mud brick with shallow foundation.[12] The villages were built on unstable slopes.[13] Many villages were entirely buried due to the landslides.[14] Aftershocks continued for a month.[15] It was also felt at Mazar-e Sharif, Kabul, Andijan, Samarkand, Islamabad, Peshawar, Rawalpindi and Dushanbe.[16]

Relief efforts

Several problems appeared during the relief operation. The affected region was remote and lacked any modern telecommunication.[17] The local culture prohibited male physicians from examining or speaking to women.[18] There was no available accurate map of the affected region.[19] However this problem was solved as the pilots of the first Tajikistan helicopters served with the Soviet Armed Forces in the area during the Soviet–Afghan War and knew many of the villages.[20] Relief efforts were also delayed because of blocked roads, bad weather and political turmoil in the region.[21]

Relief effort by several agencies in Afghanistan was administered from neighboring Pakistan, as many organizations had learned from previous experience not to base too many assets in Kabul or in any other city in Afghanistan.[22] A sub-base for the relief efforts was established in Rostaq in the Takhar Province near the Afghanistan-Tajikistan border, which in spite of lacking airfields, had open spaces for helicopter operations and a road link to Tajikistan.[23] A worldwide appeal for helicopters was made to assist in the relief operations.[24]

The United Nations (UN) and several non-governmental organizations (NGOs) were involved in the relief efforts of the affected area.[25] A joint relief operation was mounted by the UN, the International Committee of the Red Cross (ICRC), the International Federation of Red Cross and Red Crescent Societies (IFRC) and a number of national and international NGOs.[26]

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title: May 1998 Afghanistan earthquake

question: Describe the May 1998 Afghanistan Earthquake.

answer: An earthquake occurred in northern Afghanistan on 30 May 1998, at 06:22 UTC in the Takhar Province with a moment magnitude of 6.5 and a maximum Mercalli intensity of VII (_Very strong_). At the time, the Afghan Civil War was underway.

critique: "At the time, the Afghan Civil War was underway." - this is irrelevant.

critique: Answer can give a summary of the affect and the damages.

critique: The answer should mention the damage caused by the earthquake.

critique: The answer should mention the effects of the earthquake.

critique: The answer should mention the affected area.

critique: The answer omits the effects of the earthquake.

critique: The answer should include more details about the earthquake.

question: How many people were affected?

answer: Between 4,000 and 4,500 people died in Takhar and Badakhshan provinces. Nearly 7,000 families were affected and 16,000 houses were destroyed or damaged. Approximately 45,000 people became homeless. More than 30 villages were destroyed and another 70 were severely damaged.

critique: "More than 30 villages" is irrelevant to the question; "another" 70 is redundant

text: Mentioning how many houses and villages were damaged/destroyed is irrelevant since they are not people.

question: What was the response to the Earthquake like?

answer: The affected region was remote and lacked any modern telecommunication. The local culture prohibited male physicians from examining or speaking to women. There was no available accurate map of the affected region. Relief efforts were also delayed because of blocked roads, bad weather, and political turmoil in the region.

critique: The response is not related to the question.

critique: The response does not answer the question.

text: The answer should include the organizations that responded to help the earthquake victims, such as the United Nations (UN) and Red Cross.

category: coverage

question: When did relief efforts begin?

answer: Relief efforts began after the earthquake.

critique: "Relief efforts began after the earthquake." - this is incorrect because relief efforts began before the earthquake.


text:
The taxi station was dark when I walked in. As usual, before my night shifts would begin, I turned on the lights and slid myself onto a chair in the kitchen. No one had arrived yet. I got out a pack of cigarettes and placed them on the table, getting through three before Pedro barged in.

“Eeeh bro, what the fuck you think you doin’. There’s no smoking in here’.

“Fuck you, Pedro”.

Pedro giggled and went over to the coffee pot and turned it on. He had a wry smile like a birth mark. It was a part of him.

“Any bookings tonight, Prashnath?”

“Yeah. I got a weird one. I got to go out of Seattle. Tiger Mountain state forest. It’s not even near anything. Middle of nowhere. I’m shit scared, man. No houses nearby, I looked it up on maps. It’s scary as shit outside at this time of night, already, without getting killed by demons or some shit, man”.

Pedro was listening, pouring his coffee. He sat down next to me, lit a cigarette and smiled.

“You are fucked, bro”

“Shut up, I am serious. I want to cancel it. Before you walked in I was going to send this guy a message. Was going to tell him to shove his creepy forest up his arse, man”.

Pedro chuckled in the tobacco of his cigarette.

“What is the name of the place again, Prashnath”.

“Tiger Mountain”.

Pedro winced. For a moment the birth mark disappeared.

“Do not go there, bro. I am not even trying to be funny here. That place is bad. There is some fucked up stories from there. Couple of guys that worked with me back at city cabs ran into trouble there”.

“What. What do you mean. Don’t mess with me”.

“I mean if you go to this place tonight, you will seriously get sacrificed to demons or something. I swear I am not messing with you. Look at my face, bro. I am serious about this”.

“What did the guy’s at city cabs say. I swear if you are messing with me..”

“There was this big Russian guy I used to work with, yeah? His name was Vladimir or Vladislav or something like that. Anyway, doesn’t matter. This guy, like you, gets a booking at this place in Tiger forest. It was just me, Vlad, and two other guys on shift that night. Real quiet. We all head off, do our thing, and me and the two other guys are back at the station at four o’ clock.

So here we are waiting for Vlad to get back, getting really pissed off because we cannot lock up, and we want to go home. We call this guy, send him messages and everything, but no reply. Of course we start to think the worst, right. ‘Shit, Vlad’s hit a fucking tree’, we thought.

Well, we were all about to start looking for this guy when he fucking turns up. I swear to Christ bro, this guy was dirty, and had holes all over him, cuts all over his face and shit.

‘Vlad, what the fuck. What happened’ I said.’

Does not say a thing. Just sits down, has a smoke. Not a fucking thing. Eventually Vlad says he was attacked, right? Now, I want you to get this picture in your head. This guy, Vlad, is huge, bro. He is a beast. He could take anyone in a fight. Shit, he could take three. So when you see this guy walking in all torn up, saying he got attacked, it makes you think, bro: who the fuck could do that to this guy.

So I question him. It doesn’t make sense

‘What do you mean attacked. Who the fuck attacked you’ I said.

This is exactly what he said, bro.

‘I take job in Tiger forest. It take me forty minutes to get to this place, and no one there. I wait for ten, twenty minutes, no one there. I come back. There was man on road, his car broke down. I get out, I help. I tell you, man. I got bad feeling from this guy. I don’t know why, sometime you just get bad feeling, you know? But I ignore the bad feeling, I help. I go to him, but then I hear noise from tree line along side of road. All these people wearing black, only black. They come out of the trees. Some holding torches, some holding knives. It was an ambush.’

Vlad was surrounded by a satanic fucking cult in the middle of the forest, I shit you not. He tried to run back to his car, get away that way, but they got there before he did. They closed in on him, saying all this weird shit in another language. Vlad was lucky he was built like a house because he was able to charge one of the guys holding a torch. Knocked him to the ground. Had to run away into the forest.”

“That is crazy, man. There is no way I am taking this booking. I am not even going to message him back.”

I went to light another cigarette when I noticed the wry smirk reappear on Pedro’s face.

“Oh fuck you, man. Do not scare me like that.

Pedro laughed.

“No bro, for real. Watch out”.

“Yeah, yeah”.

I finished the cigarette quickly, grabbed my coat and hopped into the car, ready to start my shift; ready to go to Tiger Mountain. Pedro was full of shit, he was always like that. I started the engine. As the car sat and quietly roared I thought about Pedro’s smile, and how it collapsed into fear when I told him I was going to Tiger Mountain. Admittedly that was strange. Very strange. But Pedro was full of shit, he was always like that..

title: Tiger Mountain.

question: What does the story say about the narrator and Pedro?

answer: The narrator, Prashnath, seems to know Pedro well. Pedro often appears when the narrator is on his kitchen at the taxi station. Pedro tells him about a story about Vlad and his friends dealing with a satanic cult at the Tiger Mountain, where he has been booking a trip.

critique: The answer should mention that Prashnath ignores Pedro's warning and still goes to Tiger Mountain.

critique: Doesn't mention that Pedro tells the narrator he shouldn't head out to the Tiger Mountain.

question: What does the story say about Tiger Mountain?

answer: Tiger Mountain is a state forest in the middle of nowhere. It's not even near anything. There are no houses nearby. It's scary as hell outside at this time of night. There are some fucked up stories about Tiger Mountain. Pedro warns Prashnath not to go there because he says he's heard that there's a satanic cult there that sacrifices people to demons.

critique: The answer should mention that Prashnath ignores Pedro's warnings and goes to Tiger Mountain anyway.

critique: The answer should mention that Pedro's story about the satanic cult is a lie.

critique: Doesn't mention that Pedro claims Prashnath will be sacrificed to demons himself if he takes the booking.

critique: The answer should mention that Pedro's story is a tall tale.

critique: The narrator doesn't believe Pedro, thinking he's full of shit as usual.

text: It's omitted that Prashnath has been offered a taxi booking in Tiger Mountain.

question: What does the story say about Vlad?

answer: Vlad is a Russian guy who worked with Pedro and Prashnath at city cabs. He gets a booking at Tiger Mountain and is attacked by a satanic cult. He is huge and could take three people in a fight. He was able to charge one of the guys holding a torch, but had to run away into the forest.

critique: Vlad is not mentioned to be Prashnath's co-worker.

critique: The answer should mention that Vlad was attacked by a satanic cult.

critique: The answer should mention that Vlad is the one who tells the story.

critique:
-The answer omits that Pedro and Prashnath both worked at city cabs and are worried about exposing because they are supposed to be professionals. This is an important detail that gives more information about Vlad's story.
-The example given by Pedro to explain Vlad's story is not sufficient enough.

critique: The story doesn't mention that Vlad could take three people in a fight. It should be omitted.

critique: The answer should mention that Vlad is the one who tells Prashnath about the cult.

critique: The answer omits that Vlad was attacked by a satanic cult and that he was able to get away from them.

question: What does the story say about survival?

answer: No answer

critique: The response misses to mention that the story talks about survival due to the fact that the narrator is going to Tiger Mountain, which is said to be scary and dangerous.

critique: The answer should mention the Tiger Mountain.

critique: The answer should mention the scary story Pedro tells.

text: The answer is false, as the question can be answered. It should be mentioned that Vlad was able to survive and escape the satanic cult at Tiger Mountain.


text:
The provincial government is reporting that the conversion of thousands of older, wood-burning stoves to newer and more efficient models has improved air quality and reduced risk of fires, but the Peace Region seems content to keep its old wood stoves as a primary source of heating for many homes.

The provincial government reported that its Wood Stove Exchange Program has resulted in the conversion of more than 5,000 wood-burning stoves to cleaner-burner models since the program began in 2008, which the Ministry of Environment states resulted in a reduction of more than 310 tonnes of particulate matter pumped into the air.

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The Province said that high-efficiency wood stoves are proven to burn one-third less wood, reduce emissions by up to 70 per cent and significantly reduce the risk of chimney fires and that the approximately 116,000 older model stoves still in use around the province can affect the health of homeowners, their neighbours and overall airshed.

However, the Peace River Regional District is not a participant in that incentive program, and in a previous discussion around the provincial program, the regional board of directors noted that "while the efficiency rating of the new technology wood-burning stoves is to be commended, there are many people within our region who rely on wood burning stoves as their sole source of heat and the new stoves cannot be controlled sufficiently to provide the extended burning time needed in these situations." The reference was in regards to the newer models not having dampers on them that would allow a fire to smoulder and provide warmth for longer periods of time.

"We were concerned about the rules they (the government) were putting in place because, as it always is in our beautiful province, one size does not fit all, so the solution for the Lower Mainland may in fact not be the solution for us," said Karen Goodings, regional district board chair, on why the board resisted new regulations for solid fuel burning for domestic appliances.

Jane Parsons, a resident of Farmington, said her and her husband have been using a wood-burning stove to heat their home for over 20 years and they believe it has many benefits.

"I think in the climate we live in, it is really good to have a wood burner because you don't have to rely on any outside power to work it," said Parsons. "When the power goes out, we just close the damper and open up the back of the furnace, and it keeps the house at a level temperature of about 65 [degrees Fahrenheit, or 18 degrees Celsius] even without power."

She added it has also saved them quite a bit of money over the years.

"Over the years, Nick [her husband] has worked out that we've saved $15,000 by burning our own wood in the last 20 years," she said.

Parsons said there is a discernable difference in the kind of heat produced by wood burning over that produced by natural gas combustion.

"It's a nice, moist heat, and it's a warm heat as well," she said. "I remember when we first moved to Canada we lived in a house that was heated by natural gas, and coming from England where there's a moist atmosphere to a house burning natural gas, we had very bad dry coughs for a while, and then when we moved here (to Farmington) with this wood-burning stove, our coughs went."

She said she doesn't think the emissions produced by wood burning stoves are really very significant to the overall quality of the airshed.

"I think wood-burning stoves are very clean. I lived in England in my early days and they burned coal, which caused a lot of smog, but I think actual wood burning, personally, is not a problem," she said, adding she suspects much more smoke and pollution is generated by the slash pile burning that goes on in the region than is generated by domestic heating.

Parsons said they re very careful to make sure their wood stove is properly maintained to prevent any uncontrolled fires from starting, and she believes that is the case with most people in the region who have one.

"My husband cleans our wood burner out every month, takes all of the old ash out and makes sure the chimney is clear. I think that goes without saying that people who burn wood always keep an eye on the chimney and the furnace."

She added it is a requirement of their home insurance that they have the wood stove inspected regularly, and she had it inspected about two years ago and it still meets that requirement.

Bob Fulton, deputy fire chief with the Dawson Creek fire department, said for the most part, wood burning stoves and other appliances are usually quite safe as long as they are maintained properly. However, he said residents who let their wood-burning stoves smoulder constantly without allowing hotter fires to burn are at an increased risk of starting chimney fires.

"Too many people will set a fire in it, just get the fire going and then damper it right down and let it smoulder, and that creates creosote, which is a hazard for starting chimney fires," said Fulton.

Creosote is a highly-combustible by-product of the incomplete combustion of wood or coal.

"It's the biggest issue with wood-burning appliances for us," said Fulton.

He said allowing for a hotter fire - generally in the morning before regular use and once at the end of the day - will prevent creosote from cooling, condensing and then accumulating in a chimney flue. He added chimneys need to be swept of debris on a regular basis, as well as the firebox itself needs to be cleaned and the ashes and other waste stored in a metal container, not a cardboard box, because the coals can still be hot enough to reignite even days after the fire.

Fulton said in Dawson Creek there have been residential fires resulting from wood-burning appliances, but he said generally residents have learned how to maintain those appliances properly. However, he said upgrading to more fuel-efficient appliances does generally reduce the chances of chimney fires, as long as the chimney is right-sized to that new appliance.

question: Summarize the stated benefits of wood-burner stoves compared to new models.

answer: The older models burn more wood, at one-third less efficiency, and additional fuel is required to produce the same results. While the output is described as "moist heat," the newer units using electricity have the appearance of dry heat, causing a cold-like sensation to the throat. As for pollution, the older models produce 315 tonnes, but the new models only produce 210 tonnes. These old models, however, can be used during power shortages, which the new electric ones cannot.

critique: The number of tonnes of particulate matter is incorrect.

critique: The last two sentences are not stated in the passage.

critique: The information about the power shortages is unattested.

critique: The output is not described as "moist heat."

critique: The output of the new models is not mentioned.

question: Summarize the stated benefits of cleaner-burner models compared to wood-burning stoves.

answer: The cleaner-burner models are one third less wood, up to 70% fewer emissions, and reduce the risk of chimney fires.

critique: The answer misses to mention that cleaner-burner models reduce the risk of fires by up to 70% as well.

critique: The answer did not mention that it reduces the risk of fires.

critique: The answer should mention the reduction in particulate matter.

critique: The answer should mention the reduction of particulate matter.

critique: The answer omits the reduction of particulate matter pumped into the air.

critique: The answer omits the reduction in particulate matter pumped into the air.

question: Summarize the different viewpoints / approaches taken by the various parties mentioned in the article.

answer: The provincial government wants to encourage modern, more efficient versions of the current wood-burning stove, due to the improved air quality and reduced fire risk that this offers. Another side has created something called "solid-fuel burning for domestic appliances", by which it is implied that currently, there are rules that require you to exchange your older wood-burning stove for a new one. Another view is that if you live in a country that experiences snowfall and freezing conditions, you probably would want an emergency source of heat that doesn't require power. One person in support of a wood-burning stove had their wood-burning stove installed more than 20 years ago, and the heat provided is permanent and ever-there until you have to exchange it. Another person had a bad experience when they switched from gas-burners to wood-burning stoves, not mentioning the environmental cons/side-effects of climate change.

critique: This response is not related to the question and should be omitted.

critique: Any wood-burning stoves can be of any efficiency, old or new, so the "another side" comment does not read with much coherence.

critique: The answer is a summary of the article, not a summary of the different viewpoints.

critique: The last sentence is not relevant to the question.

critique: The last two sentences are not relevant to the question.

text: Name the different "sides"

refinement: The provincial government wants to encourage modern, more efficient versions of the current wood-burning stove, due to the improved air quality and reduced fire risk that this offers. Another side has created something called "solid-fuel burning for domestic appliances", by which it is implied that currently, there are rules that require you to exchange your older wood-burning stove for a new one. Another view is that if you live in a country that experiences snowfall and freezing conditions, you probably would want an emergency source of heat that doesn't require power. One person in support of a wood-burning stove had their wood-burning stove installed more than 20 years ago, and the heat provided is permanent and ever-there until you have to exchange it. Another person had a bad experience when they switched from gas-burners to wood-burning stoves, not mentioning the environmental cons/side-effects of climate change.

question: Summarize what the article says about the provincial government's next steps.

answer: No answer

critique: It does not answer the question but it could be related to the point that the government is not responsible for individual maintenance of the stoves

critique: The response misses to provide a proper answer to the task.


text:
	When I was young, I once asked my grandparents, "How am I supposed to see the whole world, when time passes by so fast?" Granted I was still a child, and had no idea about the horrors of the real world, but they told me to close my eyes, and imagine what lay beyond the horizon, that way you will never be disappointed with what you find. I didn't really understand at the time, but I tirelessly tried multiple times, all with no luck. Eventually I forgot about their advice, until just recently, looking out my bedroom window trying to figure out what to do with myself. I closed my eyes for five seconds, and when I had opened them, time had stopped. My name is William Hale, and this is my story.
	Yeah, I know, its a cheesy way to start a story, but I'm new to this so give me a break. Anyway, it turns out I had the power to stop time, kind of. I couldn't interact with anything outside of my body, because my physical body was right there, standing there, blankly staring out the window at a still world. I moved down the stairs(I tried walking but soon discovered I had no legs, so it was more of a directional hover) and found my parents watching the television in the living room. The evening news was frozen and I let out a quiet laugh at the news anchor's face. It was frozen midsentence, making him look like  a clown.
	So, I could apparently move between the hands of time, and honestly, I was surprisingly underwhelmed. I returned to my room and stared at my body, thinking about what I could do now. I could see the world (traveling at the speedy pace of 2 miles an hour) but what else. I was alone, nobody to share the experience with. Hell, I'm socially awkward enough, I'm sure I would seem extremely sane describing a still-shot of perhaps the pyramids, or the Colosseum in Rome. That's when I realized, I don't know HOW to get back. My body was right there in front of me, yet I couldn't touch it, only move through it.
	Now I was faced with the challenge of returning. First try, retracing my steps. I closed my eyes, counted to five  and opened, no luck. In all honesty, it was my only thought. I walked through my physical body five different ways, but still no luck. I sighed and stood next to my body, rested my hands on the windowsill and looked at the frozen world. Then it sparked. I moved over until I was standing inside myself (weird) completely standing as it stood. Still nothing. So I closed my eyes and hoped I would return.
	It was the longest five seconds of my life. Just as I was about to give up I heard the A/C blowing air through the vent. My eyes shot open and the cars were moving down the road. I sprinted downstairs and my parents shot their gaze over to me. My mother asked, "What's wrong Will?"
	I opened my mouth as to answer them. I was going to tell them, how I stopped time, about the stupid news anchor's face a moment ago, about my fear of being stuck, but hearing it all in my head, I would definitely be committed to the nearest mental hospital. I let out the big breath I took and replied, "Nothing." I slowly retreated upstairs to my room. I shut the door behind me and slid to the ground, well aware of the giant grin on my face.
	I had a secret. Not just any secret though, a power, like a super-power. Granted it wasn't exactly efficient, but it was something nobody else had (to my knowledge).
	I decided to experiment with this power. I started simply enough, leaving and returning, just so I could get the hang of it. If so much as a finger was out of place when I tried to return, nothing would happen, so I used my computer chair as my starting point. An easy place to relax in, that isn't in an odd form.
	Next was testing my limits. I couldn't travel through walls or windows. I couldn't walk through most doors, unless there was some form of a window in the door. As for distance, I don't believe there was a limit. I hovered at first down the road, to the bend, then to the edge of town, and finally, when I was feeling brave enough, to the next town. (I feel its also worth mentioning that this was within an hour of discovering about my power.)
	Now, I was at a loss. I could stop time. Great. In due time, I could see the world(eventually), but all that time would account for nothing. I would exist as a ghost beyond time, and when I returned, nothing will have happened. No time will have passed, Nobody would be the wiser, and I couldn't tell anybody. I returned to my body and sat in my computer chair, watching the sun slowly set. It was odd, watching, almost feeling time pass.
	My mind wandered, wondering how I had unlocked this power, why it was me, and if there were others, and I couldn't help but think, what if I had finally lost it. Since I was young, my social anxiety put me in a kind of depression, so I wondered, did it finally snap? Have I gone insane?
	I went to sleep early that night. I was comforted by the fact that I was more tired than usual. At least there was some effect from this power, albeit a negative one. I had no dreams that night, but it was the best sleep I had gotten in a long time. Whether I was sane or not, I was just happy that my life had taken a step forward, for the first time in three years, but if it was a step in the right direction, or the wrong one has yet to be seen.

title: [RF] Blink

question: What new power has William Hale discovered

answer: William Hale has discovered the ability to stop time.

critique: Doesn't mention being able to move through time.

critique: The answer is a bit too vague. It should be more specific.

critique: There should be something in this sentence to designate this as a new power. Hale does not realize that he has the ability to stop time--he thinks it's a power.

critique: The answer should mention that William can also move through time.

critique: It is omitted that William can move through time.

question: What problem did William encounter when he'd had enough of his hovering travels?

answer: He couldn't get back to his body.

critique: The answer should mention that William couldn't touch his body.

critique: "I couldn't get back to his body." - change to "I couldn't get back to their body" for better world building (necessary for a more immersive experience).

critique: It's omitted that William couldn't touch his body.

critique: The answer should mention that he was stuck in time.

critique: The answer should mention that William couldn't get back to his body because he couldn't touch it.

critique: Add that he thought he'd never get back.

question: What are the long-term problems that William faces?

answer: He can't interact with anything outside of his body, and he can't touch his own body. He can't interact with other people. He can't travel through walls or doors. He is a ghost beyond time, and when he returns, nothing will have happened.

critique: The answer is a summary of the story, not a description of the long-term problems William faces.

critique: The answer should mention that William is a social outcast.

critique: The last sentence is irrelevant to the question.

critique: He is a ghost beyond time and when he returns, nothing will have happened.

question: Do other people have the same powers as William?

answer: It is not stated.

critique: While "It is not stated." is acceptable legal/simplistic answer, a more interesting answer would be thatWilliam cannot prove that others have the same power as him. William cannot say with certainty whether there are others like him.

critique: It is stated that William is the only one who has this power.

critique: The answer should mention that the story implies that William is the only one with this power.

critique: The story implies that William is the only one with this power.

critique: This is technically true, but it is strongly implied that they do not.

critique: It is implied that no one else has the same power.

text: The answer could specify that William wonders this and does not know (therefore the reader also does not know).


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Davis Bertans has suddenly become one of the NBA's most dangerous shooters, drastically altering the trajectory of his career in the process. | Credit: Patrick Smith/Getty Images/AFP

-   Davis Bertans is the best shooter you’ve never heard of.
-   The fourth-year pro has drastically altered the trajectory of his career in the season’s early going.
-   An increasingly frequent subject of trade rumors and a free agent this summer, Bertans will be bombing threes for years to come.

Davis Bertans had already made six three-pointers when he caught the ball several feet behind the arc with Devonte’ Graham right in his chest. Despite a defender pressuring him hard and 20 seconds remaining on the shot clock, the Washington Wizards’ marksman let fly anyway.

Splash.

What would qualify as a heat check for most any other player was actually anything but for Bertans. On his way to becoming one of basketball’s most imminently dangerous three-point shooters, the 6-foot-10 red head has routinely rendered that type of aggressive defense moot in the season’s early going.

And he’s doing it on a nightly basis, too.

Coming Out of Nowhere

Anyone telling you they saw Bertans’ long-range onslaught coming this season is lying.

A fourth-year pro who only came to the NBA in 2016 after being drafted a half decade earlier, he was a largely forgettable role player throughout his tenure with the San Antonio Spurs. Bertans made subtle strides as a long-range shooter between each of his seasons in the Alamo City, development that crested in 2018-19 when he shot an elite 42.9 percent on 4.4 three-point attempts per game.

Those are fantastic numbers but still not the type that made him a truly game-changing shooter. Bertans’ triples with the Spurs were mostly limited to weak-side spot-up attempts and set plays. Gregg Popovich certainly gave him the green light, but Bertans rarely deviated from San Antonio’s offense to launch.

With the Wizards, though, he doesn’t need to worry about the prospect of hijacking possessions by taking triples outside the flow of the offense. Coach Scott Brooks is leaning hard into a free-flowing, all-offense approach with his non-contending team, an ethos no player has benefited from more than Bertans.

He’s already shot 198 triples this season, seventh-most in the league and an average of 8.6 tries per game – nearly double his career-high. Bertans hasn’t sacrificed accuracy for frequency, either, shooting a scorching 46.5 percent from deep, the second-best mark in the NBA among high-usage shooters.

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This isn’t some example of sample size telling a story that otherwise wouldn’t exist, either. Bertans is taking some of the most difficult three-point attempts in the league, and making them look easy.

New Present, New Future

It should come as no surprise that Bertans has been one of Washington’s most impactful players this season. His 115.5 offensive rating is best on the team by far, as is his off-court offensive rating of 104.9. Other than Bradley Beal, no player on the roster has been more instrumental to the Wizards’ fifth-ranked offense than Bertans.

His name has been increasingly floated in trade scenarios of late, and it’s not hard to see why. Every team in the league could use the services of a dead-eye shooter, especially one who stands nearly seven-feet tall. Bertans will be the subject of trade rumors until they ultimately come to fruition or the trade deadline comes and goes on Feb. 6.

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Regardless, the 27-year-old has drastically altered the trajectory of his career over the first two months of 2019-20. He’s a free agent this summer and is due a major pay increase on his $7 million salary whether he finishes this season in the nation’s capital or elsewhere.

It’s time to familiarize yourself with Bertans, basketball fans. After serving as an anonymous afterthought for most of his career, he’ll be a fixture of NBA highlight reels for many years to come.

question: What does the article say about three-point shooters in the NBA?

answer: No answer

critique: The article does talk about three-point shooters in the NBA.

critique: The article says that Davis Bertans is one of the NBA's most dangerous shooters.

text: It is omitted that Bertans has already shot 198 triples this season, seventh-most in the league and an average of 8.6 tries per game – nearly double his career-high. Bertans hasn’t sacrificed accuracy for frequency, either, shooting a scorching 46.5 percent from deep, the second-best mark in the NBA among high-usage shooters.

question: What does the article say about two versus three-point shoots?

answer: No answer

critique: The question is asking about the difference between two and three-point shots. The answer is empty.

critique: The article does not mention anything about two versus three-point shoots.

critique: The answer should mention that the article focuses on three-point shoots.

critique: It is incorrect that the answer is not there.

critique: The article does not discuss two versus three-point shoots.


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JERI M. MASSI (born 1960 in Levittown, Pennsylvania[1]) is a contract technical writer and an Evangelical Christian author whose novel _Valkyries: Some Through the Fire_ (2003) was nominated for a Christy Award.

Since 2001, Massi has attacked the response of Fundamentalist churches in cases of child molestation committed by members of the clergy in which the leadership (and sometimes the entire congregation) enforced silence on the victims.[2]

In 2005, Massi produced a five-part audio documentary, _The Lambs of Culpeper_,[3] and released it onto the Internet for free download. The documentary addresses alleged abuses against children at Calvary Baptist Church of Culpeper, Virginia, a church then pastored by Charles Shifflett. In 2007, Massi founded the Conference of the Lambs, a two-day conference designed to assist adults who had been molested as children in Fundamentalist churches.[4] In 2008 Massi self-published _Schizophrenic Christianity_, which denounced corruption within Protestant Fundamentalism that had resulted in harm, especially to children.[5] In 2009, Massi conducted interviews of former residents of Hephzibah House in Warsaw, Indiana, a Protestant Fundamentalist Children's home for girls. She then produced _The Lambs of Hephzibah House_,[6] an audio documentary that alleges severe abuse of residents at Hephzibah House. In 2011, Gary Tuchman, a CNN journalist reporting for _Anderson Cooper 360_, interviewed many of the same former residents and produced an episode about Hephzibah House on CNN's “Ungodly Discipline” series.[7]

Works

-   _Derwood Inc._ (June 1986; Peabody Adventure Series, Book 1)
-   _A Dangerous Game_ (June 1986; Peabody Adventure Series, Book 2)
-   _Treasure in the Yukon_ (October 1986; Peabody Adventure Series, Book 3)
-   _The Bridge_ (1986; Bracken Trilogy, Book 1)
-   _Courage by Darkness_ (December 1987; Peabody Adventure Series, Book 4)
-   _Crown and Jewel_ (1987; Bracken Trilogy, Book 2)
-   _The Two Collars_ (April 1988; Bracken Trilogy, Book 3)
-   _Llamas on the Loose_ (June 1988; Peabody Adventure Series, Book 5)
-   _Abandoned_ (1 May 1989; Peabody Adventure Series, Book 6)
-   _Valkyries: Some Through the Fire_ (2003)
-   _Valkyries: All Through the Blood_ (2003)
-   _Schizophrenic Christianity_ (2008)
-   _Hall of Heroes: A Novel Set in Peabody, Wisconsin_ (14 October 2013)

Notes

[1]

[2] Opposition to abusive fundamentalist churches took form with the publication of Vic Nischik, _Wizard of God: My Life with Jack Hyles_ (Buchanan, Mi.: Sychar Publishing, 1990) and gained impetus with the publication of Voyle Glover, _Fundamental Seduction: The Jack Hyles case_ (Schrerville, Indiana: Brevia Publishing, 1990) who marshaled evidence against Jack Hyles and First Baptist Church of Hammond regarding abuses of church office and church doctrine. Massi was further influenced by a 1993 news documentary Preying from the Pulpit, produced by WJBK of Detroit. Audio of this documentary is available at Massi's website . In 2012, Flashrock Films' executive producer Adam Rockoff engaged Massi as associate producer of the independent film, _The Blue Room,_ a documentary examining the abuses at Hephzibah House (unreleased).

[3] http://www.jeriwho.net/tloc.html

[4] The first conference was held in Charlotte, North Carolina, the second in Jacksonville, Florida.

[5] Jeri Massi, _Schizophrenic Christianity: How Christian Fundamentalism Attracts and Protects Sociopaths, Abusive Pastors, and Child Molesters_ (Raleigh, NC.: Jupiter Rising Books, 2008). Massi has also critiqued fundamentalism through the serialised stories _Secret Radio_ and _A Standard Christian_, which chronicle the life of a student at fictional Greater Independent Baptist College.

[6] http://www.jeriwho.net/tlohh.html

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title: Jeri Massi

question: Summarize Jeri Massi's works.

answer: Jeri Massi has published a number of novels, such as Derwood Inc, Treasure in the Yukon, and The Bridge. She's also written short stories. She's also published documentaries such as "The Lambs of Hephzibah House" based on the experiences of former residents at Hephzibah House, an evangelical Christian home for girls.

critique: Ms Massi has attacked fundamentalists through her documentary on church abuse, as well as her activity in support of adult victims of childhood sexual abuse in fundamentalist Christian communities.

critique: "She's also published documentaries such as "The Lambs of Hephzibah House" based on the experiences of former residents at Hephzibah House, an evangelical Christian home for girls." - this is inaccurate. Massi produced an audio documentary, not a documentary.

critique: The answer omits the fact that Massi is an Evangelical Christian author.

critique: "She's also published documentaries such as "The Lambs of Hephzibah House" based on the experiences of former residents at Hephzibah House, an evangelical Christian home for girls." - this is incorrect. The "documentary" was an audio documentary released in 2005.

critique: The response inaccurately mentions that Massi has published short stories. However, she has not.

critique: "She's also published documentaries such as "The Lambs of Hephzibah House" based on the experiences of former residents at Hephzibah House, an evangelical Christian home for girls." - this is inaccurate. Massi produced a documentary about alleged abuses against children at Calvary Baptist Church of Culpeper. She also founded the Conference of the Lambs, a two-day conference designed to assist adults who had been molested as children in Fundamentalist churches. She also produced an audio documentary that alleges severe abuse of residents at Hephzibah House.

critique: "She's also published documentaries such as "The Lambs of Hephzibah House" based on the experiences of former residents at Hephzibah House, an evangelical Christian home for girls." - this is incorrect. Massi only produced an audio documentary on the alleged abuses at Calvary Baptist Church of Culpeper, Virginia.

question: Summarize Jeri Massi's attempts to expose corruption in Protestant Fundamentalist churches.

answer: Jeri Massi produced an audio documentary called "The Lambs of Culpeper." In this article, a church called Calvary Baptist Church of Culpeper is being called out for "abuses against children." The related audio documentary has caused a stir and may force some clergy and congregations within the organization to reevaluate their views on prayer. In response to the documentary, Jeri Massi founded The Conference of the Lambs, a two-day conference designed to assist adults who had been molested as children in Fundamentalist churches.

critique: The response contains inaccurate information.

critique: "In response to the documentary, Jeri Massi founded The Conference of the Lambs, a two-day conference designed to assist adults who had been molested as children in Fundamentalist churches." -The first response to "The Lambs of Culpeper" was an Audio Documentary that Jeri self-published in 2005. There was never mention of a response to "The Lambs of Culpeper." The Conference of The Lambs was established in 2007.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

text: Include information about "Schizophrenic Christianity" and Hephzibah House

question: Summarize Jeri Massi's relationship to Christianity.

answer: No answer

text: Massi is an Evangelical Christian


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_HORMONES_ (; ) is a 2008 Thai romantic comedy film directed by Songyos Sugmakanan. The literal meaning of the Thai title is 'restless hearts during school break' or 'school break, hearts aflutter'.

Plot

The film revolves around a group of high school and university students during their school break, and the relationships that develop (or don't). Four romantic threads are interwoven in the film's plot. Both Pu (Charlie Trairat) and Mai (Sirachuch Chienthaworn) are in competition for Nana (Ungsumalynn Sirapatsakmetha) while class geek Jo (Ratchu Surachalas) is in love with a popular girl C (Chutima Teepanat). Meanwhile, Oh Lek (Focus Jirakul) is wild about Taiwanese pop sensation Didi (Lu Ting Wei), and Hern (Chantawit Thanasewee) is thinking of cheating on his girlfriend Nuan (Thaniya Ummaritchoti) when he meets Japanese tourist Aoi (Sora Aoi).[1]

Cast

-   Charlie Trairat as Pu
-   Sirachuch Chienthaworn as Mai
-   Ungsumalynn Sirapatsakmetha as Nana
-   Focus Jirakul as Oh Lek
-   Ratchu Surajaras as Jo
-   Chutima Teepanat as C
-   Thaniya Ummaritchoti as Nuan
-   Chantawit Thanasewee as Hern
-   Sora Aoi as Aoi
-   Lu Ting Wei as Didi
-   Chaleumpol Tikumpornteerawong

Production

Director Sugmakanan admits he was inspired by the format of the British romantic comedy Love Actually but points out that relationships in Asian culture are not comparable to those in Western culture.[2]

The studio was anxious to avoid the possible controversy involved in having Japanese adult video star Sora Aoi in a movie directed at a teen audience so her name was omitted in promotional materials although she appears in the trailer.[3] Sugmakanan has said that the segment in which Aoi appears was based on a friend's actual experiences.[4]

Reception

The film saw national release in 163 theatres and earned an unprecedented (for GTH films) 10 million baht on its first day, totalling 34.1 million in its opening weekend. It earned a total of 80 million baht in the box office and was the third-largest grossing Thai film in 2008.[5][6]

A Daily XPress review of the movie calls it “sexy and funny” as well as “Thought-provoking and nostalgic”.[7] The film won the Jury's Special Prize at the fourth Asian Marine Film Festival held in Makuhari, Japan, an award which one journalist ascribes to the presence of Sora Aoi.[8]

Awards

  Year   Award                                  Category                                          Country    Result
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  2008   4th Asian Marine Film Festival         The Juries' Special Prize                         Japan
  2009   6th Starpics Thai Films Awards         Best Picture                                      Thailand
  2009   6th Starpics Thai Films Awards         Best Director                                     Thailand
  2009   6th Starpics Thai Films Awards         Best Film Editing                                 Thailand
  2009   18th Thai National Film Awards         Best Supporting Actress (Focus Jirakul)           Thailand
  2009   18th Thai National Film Awards         Best Costume Design                               Thailand
  2009   17th Bangkok Critics Assembly Awards   Best Picture                                      Thailand
  2009   17th Bangkok Critics Assembly Awards   Best Director                                     Thailand
  2009   17th Bangkok Critics Assembly Awards   Best Supporting Actor (Ratchu Surajaras)          Thailand
  2009   17th Bangkok Critics Assembly Awards   Best Supporting Actress (Focus Jirakul)           Thailand
  2009   17th Bangkok Critics Assembly Awards   Best Screenplay                                   Thailand
  2009   17th Bangkok Critics Assembly Awards   Best Film Editing                                 Thailand
  2009   17th Bangkok Critics Assembly Awards   Best Original Score                               Thailand
  2009   6th Hamburger Awards                   Best Actress (Focus Jirakul)                      Thailand
  2009   6th Hamburger Awards                   Favourite Scene-Stealing Actress (Sora Aoi)       Thailand
  2009   6th Hamburger Awards                   Best Original Song (รอเธอหันมา – โฟกัส จิระกุล)   Thailand
  2009   6th Hamburger Awards                   Best Original Song (อย่างน้อย – บิ๊กแอส)          Thailand

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title: Hormones (film)

question: Write a short summary of the show's plot.

answer: The show is about a group of high school and university students during their school break, and the relationships that develop (or don't).

critique: The answer should mention the four romantic threads.

critique: Legend holds that it was a Thai romantic comedy film.

critique: Doesn't mention the four romantic threads.

critique: The answer should mention the romantic threads.

question: What does the text say about the show's production process?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention the inspiration for the film.