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For years, diversity in most organizations has been largely a numbers game.

Leaders worked to understand the baseline of women and underrepresented minorities in their workforce and viewed increasing those numbers as the solution to the diversity parity problem. But a focus on numbers addresses only half of the factors required for your organization to truly benefit from diversity.

The missing piece -- perhaps even more essential -- is how well women and underrepresented minorities are actually included in the culture that you have created. Don’t confuse “hiring” with “inclusion.” Inclusion is more than a seat at the table; it’s having your voice heard and your opinions and expertise valued, even if your perspectives differ from others on the team and especially if they do.

Aside from recruiting talent to your organization to close the diversity gap, what can you do to improve inclusion? Begin by examining the individual human factors that can stifle it from happening.

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There are four major human factors that define the contribution to an inclusive culture that any member of your team can make. Understanding how to assess and leverage these factors is key to creating a culture that not only has diverse representation, but benefits from it.

Drivers of mindset

Each of the individuals on your team was raised with a set of tenets around race, ethnicity, gender, sexual orientation and other differences. Those beliefs translated into an accepted set of norms that influenced how these people behave when interacting with people different from themselves.

Creating an inclusive culture requires recognizing and evaluating the personal beliefs at play in workplace interactions so each team member can understand how he or she came to adopt their worldview around diversity. An assessment of every leader/manager's level of cultural competency is essential to revealing the level of capability they possess to contribute to building an inclusive environment and driving productivity in significant ways.

In one recent cultural competency assessment, for example, all of the sales managers in a specific region were evaluated, and the results revealed a near-perfect correlation with their sales performance.  As a leader, therefore, eliminating individuals from the team who demonstrate “conscious incompetence” around cultural inclusion may be the tough decision that you have to make.

These are individuals who are rooted in beliefs that make inclusion impossible. Worse, they have no desire to change and are, thus, “consciously incompetent” as it relates to cultural inclusion. They are likely not your best performers overall.

Inherent personality

Purpose Linked Consulting’s research on purpose and passion revealed that each of us possesses 10 distinct personality factors in the form of observable passions that influence how we interact with and are perceived by others. According to the research, our passions are derived from our deeper sense of purpose, so they are important elements of personality that play a role in workplace interactions.

As a leader, assessing how the 10 personality factors, or passion archetypes, are operating on your team is central to supporting an inclusive culture. The Passion Profiler assessment is designed to help you leverage your team’s passion archetypes by creating a common language through which individuals can understand the value that each person brings to the team, and how each person’s passions offer the diversity of perspective required to solve problems and execute strategies.

The assessment also helps individuals better understand the genesis of their conflicts so they appreciate that not all conflicting views are rooted in commonly viewed differences like race, gender, and so on.

Team inclusion

Mindset and passion has a significant impact on team interactions but, until recently, rarely has it been assessed scientifically. While conducting her Illusion of Inclusion research in 1990, Patricia Pope, CEO of Pope Consulting, found that some employees think they are more included than they actually are, while others can be more included than they believe they have been.

Today, many organizations that are committed to diversity and inclusion use employee-engagement surveys as a proxy for measuring inclusion without a process for measuring inclusion itself. “I found this to be an odd phenomenon,” Pope shared. “After all, organizations don’t measure productivity by asking employees how hard they think they are working.”

Clearly  more well-defined measures were needed. Pope’s solution was to create the Team Inclusion Profile assessment, a tool that measures both team effectiveness and inclusion, allowing leaders to understand what inclusion looks like on a day-to-day basis.

“My 40+ years of working in the D&I industry shows that inclusive cultures can be measured over time. We see this through increased ability to retain employees from diverse backgrounds. Upward mobility of those from diverse backgrounds are also viewed as ‘merit based’ (rather than as special treatment or affirmative action hires or promotions),"  said Pope. "Most important of all, these organizations experience breakthrough innovation. The Team Inclusion Profile shows you where you’re starting and what steps need to be taken to expand inclusion among team members."

Training and accountability

Focusing on diversity training first is where most organizations begin when attempting to address perceived issues in the culture. Yet, doing so without assessing the human factors described above will likely yield disappointing results.

Training is not a panacea for driving behavioral change, especially when that needed change isn’t rooted in a deep understanding of the impact that individual mindset and personality can have on inclusion. Training should follow a robust assessment process so that it can be customized to address specific issues discovered on an individual and environmental basis. Training should also be reinforced with accountability measures and feedback, prompting individuals to remain committed to demonstrating the behaviors required to create and maintain a culture of inclusion.

In summary:

-   METRICS MATTER. Assess where individuals are on a mindset and personality level so that they and you are aware of their cultural capabilities and passions. This empowers employees to take steps to increase their cultural competency where necessary.
-   LEVERAGE A COMMON LANGUAGE, such as the passion archetypes, for individuals to understand how aspects of personality, such as passion, influence team and interpersonal interactions. A common language can serve as a vehicle for healthy feedback and collaboration.
-   MEASURE INCLUSION, and don’t mistake engagement for it. It’s true that people become more engaged when they feel included, but you can lose a whole lot of talent waiting for engagement scores to rise as inclusion lags.
-   BUILD ACCOUNTABILITY THROUGH SHORT-TERM ACTION PLANS WITH FORWARD-LEANING OBJECTIVES. Monitor these plans closely and update them quarterly. Setting long-term diversity and inclusion goals is fine, but short-term milestones that are carefully monitored makes those goals a reality.
-   To reinforce an inclusive culture, CREATE A SAFE SPACE FOR DISCUSSION, DIALOGUE AND DISSENTING VIEWS, both on your team and within the larger organization. If individuals feel free to raise viewpoints, you’re likely to create better solutions and gain important insights about issues before they fester into larger problems.

Creating a diverse and inclusive culture requires an elegant process that embraces the whole of the personalities and mindsets at play in the organization. Almost no organization seeking to thrive and remain competitive can afford to do without it.

_Alaina Love is chief operating officer and president of Purpose Linked Consulting and co-author of “The Purpose Linked Organization: How Passionate Leaders Inspire Winning Teams and Great Results” (McGraw-Hill). She is a recovering HR executive, a global speaker and leadership expert, and passionate about everything having to do with, well … passion. Her passion archetypes are Builder, Transformer and Healer. You can learn more about how to grow leaders, build passionate teams and leverage passion to create great customer outcomes here._

_When she’s not working with her Fortune 500 client base, Love is busy writing her next book, “Passionality, The Art and Science of Finding Your Passion and Living Your Bliss,” which explores the alignment of personality, purpose and passion, and the science of how it contributes to our well being. Follow Love on Twitter, Facebook, YouTube or her blog._

_If you enjoyed this article, sign up for SmartBrief’s free e-mails for HR execs and for any workplace leader, among SmartBrief's more than 200 industry-focused newsletters._

question: Summarize some of the reasons women are not being included in the hiring process, or not being hired. Speculation is okay based on the information in the article.

answer: It seems the author once worked at an organization that focused more on including women in their culture than the results of particular individuals. The company must've felt that the people were incompatible with such a subtle logic.

critique: The article does not say anything about the author's previous employment

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critique: There is no evidence that the author worked at an organization that focused more on including women.

question: Describe some of the ideal traits of an employee and why they make someone an ideal candidate for many positions.

answer: Those who are in non-majority groups are the right fit for any position a company might carry forward. This is because humans were born to follow what makes sense to them. It is a human instinct to put their faith in such groups because they want to identify with those they can relate to the most.

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question: Describe the four ways that workplaces can benefit from the services of Purpose Linked Consulting.

answer: The consultancy would help to eliminate the conscious incompetence of the individuals who do not contribute to the culture of inclusion in your organization. They could also help your organization to learn how to assess and leverage the human factors of your organizational culture. The consultancy also have methods of evaluating your cultural competency that relate specifically to your ability to creatively solve problems and execute strategies. Purpose Linked Consulting offers a team-inclusion profile to measure both team effectiveness and inclusion. They would also measure inclusion without mistaking this for engagement, offering definition and utilizing the definition and metrics armed with collaborative goals to ensure these goals are met.

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question: Summarize the purpose of a safe space and what it can foster.

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_'Edmund (or EDMOND) Meyrick_' (or MEYRICKE) (1636 – 24 April 1713) was a Welsh cleric and benefactor of Jesus College, Oxford, where scholarships are still awarded in his name. He is a member of the Meyrick family.

Life

Meyrick was born at Garthlwyd, Llandderfel (near Bala, Merionethshire) and christened in Llandderfel on 11 June 1636. He attended four schools, including one year at Ruthin School, before matriculating at Jesus College, Oxford in 1656. He was elected to a scholarship in 1658 and obtained his BA degree in 1659.[1] He was ordained both deacon and priest by Robert Skinner, Bishop of Oxford, on 30 August 1660 in the chapel of New College, Oxford.[2] In 1662, he was elected to a probationary Fellowship of the college, but married in 1663 and became ineligible for a full fellowship. He became vicar of Eynsham on 10 August 1663.[3] He was chaplain to Richard, Earl of Carbery — the Meyricks and the Carberys being related – and this connection led to Meyrick's appointment to a number of lucrative positions in West Wales.[4] Meyrick became vicar of Llangathen in 1665, vicar of Llanegwad and a Canon of St David's Cathedral in 1667, rector of Burton, Pembrokeshire in 1670, treasurer of St David's in 1690 and rector of Penboyr in 1713. He was also a canon of Christ College, Brecon and vicar of Carmarthen; he held many of these positions at the same time. He died in Carmarthen, where he was then living, on 24 April 1713, and was buried in St Peter's Church; a memorial to him was placed on the north wall of the chancel.[5]

Bequests

Meyrick's wife and only child had predeceased him, enabling a more generous disposition of his assets.[6] He had extensive property interests, in both North and South Wales. The family seat was in Ucheldre, Gwyddelwern, Merionethshire and Meyrick also owned several houses in Carmarthen.[7] In 1708, he set up a charity school in Carmarthen but for some reason directed in his will that the school and master should be moved to Bala, where it became the Bala Grammar School.[8] The will provided for an annual payment of £15 to the schoolmaster together with the use of the schoolhouse, and £15 per year for clothing for the students.[9]

His will, dated 25 March 1712, said: He left family property in Denbighshire and Merionethshire, as well as his Carmarthen property after expiration of some life interests, to the college to provide six scholarships of £10 and six exhibitions of £8. The scholarships and exhibitions were to be awarded to Jesus College students from North Wales, until they obtained their Master of Arts degree or were receiving more than £40 per year from a parish appointment. Any surplus was to be used to buy advowsons so that the College might present one of the scholars (or in default of a suitable scholar, a Meyrick exhibitioner or a North Wales fellow of the College) to a parish position.[10] Whilst the estate produced a surplus, only one living was purchased by the trustees, that of the rectory of Llandow in 1735. Further increases in the surplus led to an increase in payments to Bala School and to the scholars and exhibitioners, and to the purchase of other property in Cheltenham and Carmarthen.[11][12] This proved to be a profitable investment since, by 1840, the college had received more than £10,000 through the sale of trust land near Cheltenham for railway purposes. Payments to Bala School ended in 1862, when the annual payments were commuted for a lump-sum payment of £5,333.[13]

Meyrick scholarships and exhibitions are still awarded to students at Jesus College, based on academic merit. Students performing consistently at a first-class standard during the year in the opinion of their tutors may be awarded a Meyrick scholarship, with consistent performance at upper second to first-class standard potentially leading to the award of a Meyrick exhibition.[14] The restriction in Meyrick's bequest that the scholarships were for students from North Wales only was relaxed in 1857 to cover students from all of Wales and Monmouthshire.[15][16] The restrictions have been further relaxed and students who were not born in Wales are also now eligible for a Meyrick scholarship or exhibition if they are the child of a native of Wales, are able to speak Welsh or they were educated for the last three years of secondary school in Wales.[17]

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text: He set up a charity school in Bala, Wales, which his will provided payments for. Additionally, his will provided scholarships for students from Wales for years and there are still scholarships awarded in his name to students from Wales at Jesus College, Oxford.

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refinement: He appears to have had strong ties to Wales. He attended schools there, was a clergyman there, and owned a house there.

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CPC GANGBANGS were a Montreal, Quebec-based garage punk band,[1] composed of former members of bands Les Sexareenos (1999–2002), The Spaceshits (1995–99), Lyle Sheraton and the Daylight Lovers (1997–99), Grime, and Milky Ways.

History

CPC Gangbangs was established in 2001 as The Gangbangs. It was originally intended as a punk band influenced by the likes of Black Flag. Its first single was released in 2002 by High School Refuse Records, titled “When All Turns To Shit.”

In early 2003, the band was renamed CPC Gangbangs, and guitarist and vocalist Paul Spence, (previously a member of the punk rock band Lyle Sheraton and the Daylight Lovers, and co-star of the mockumentary cult classic _FUBAR: The Movie_), joined the band.[2] Soon Daylight Lovers' bassist Roy Vucino, using the stage name Choyce, joined as well, creating more changes to the band's sound. Spence and Choyce shared songwriting duties and stage presence evenly. After entering and completing a drug detoxification program, Choyce returned to the band with renewed health and incorporated experiences of crime and hard drug-related experiences in the lyrics of songs for the band. He also included imagery and lyrical content influenced by Aleister Crowley, Austin Osman Spare.[3] While playing mainly garage punk, CPC Gangbangs incorporated elements of space rock and thrash metal into their music. With this lineup, the CPC Gangbangs performed live shows regularly in Montreal and later in Toronto.[4]

The group's debut LP “Mutilation Nation” was released in 2007 on Swami Records.[5] The band then went out on tour in support of the album.[6] That year the band released a single, “The Broken Glass”.[7]

Following the departure of key members and the arrest of another in the USA, Choyce released a statement declaring the band's dissolution in 2008. Some of the members formed a new outfit under the name Red Mass, and continued to use the imagery and Crowley influences of the previous band.

Discography

Albums

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  2007   _Mutilation Nation_   Swami   First full-length LP.

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  2007   _World War III 7"_       Profet Records              Limited run of 500 copies; Catalog No. PR10
  2007   _The Broken Glass 7"_    Seeing Eye Records          Picture disc; Catalog No. SE005; B-side: “Rich Rich Rich”
  2007   _Teenage Crimewave 7"_   Die Slaughterhaus Records   Limited run of 500 copies; Catalog No. DSH015b; B-side: “Blood on the Wall”

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[2] “Le dark side CPC Gangbangs’ Montreal includes blood”. _Now Toronto_, by Tim Perlich August 16, 2007

[3] “Magick and mayhem”. _Montreal Mirror_, by JOHNSON CUMMINS, June 14. Archived at the Wayback Machine.

[4] “Jay Reatard Punches Audience Member, Walks Out On Show”. _Chart Attack_, Apr 18, 2008

[5] “CPC Gangbangs Mutilation Nation”. _Exclaim!_, By Josiah Hughes. Oct 29, 2007

[6] “CPC Gangbangs” . _Mongrelzine_, June 2, 2008 BOB SCOTT

[7] “CPC GANGBANGS The Broken Glass”. Kalle Stille, _Ox-Fanzine_ Issue #76 (February/March 2008).

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Wielding their torches, men traverse the galaxy shining light into the darkness, searching for a new hope for their people. For a century men searched, and a century later, humanity found the hope they were looking for. They found a new world, a habitat suitable for their own.

So they returned to Earth with the news; another world for the taking. More fruit, ripe for picking. Their people throw themselves to the scientists and engineers of their generation. The scientists and engineers build a vessel, to carry humans beyond the home they once knew, and into a land no Earthling had ever laid eyes upon.

A select few board the craft and begin their voyage. Their departure is played up to ridiculous extremes. These men and women become gods in the eyes of men. However, upon arrival to the new world, they encounter an issue.

Their newly claimed world has, in fact, already been claimed by a people unknown to humanity. This should have been a riveting discovery, a discovery that would change how humans view the universe.

However, the hero men and women purposely provoke the naturally peaceful and curious indigenous beings, and the beings instinctively retaliate. A report is sent back to their Earth-dwelling superiors: it is now known that the land they once thought was theirs for the taking is populated by savage, hostile beasts. The beasts attacked the brave men and women of Earth on sight, and proper measures were taken to rectify the situation.

Rage spreads like plague on Earth. How dare these beasts endanger our heroes, our saviors, our gods? The people once again throw themselves, but this time to the governments, and militaries of their generation. The answer is simple. War.

So the humans construct an armada of vessels to carry Earth’s finest to reclaim their rightfully conquered land out in the cosmos. For a decade, war rages on the new planet. Twice a year every year, the humans send troops to bolster the war effort. World superpowers pour cash into the war like a waterfall into a bottomless lake. The people of earth begin to face the consequences of their newly allocated funds; times are hard. Every family must ration each consumable item once held dear to their hearts. But not a single person complains, because surely their suffering directly affects the cause.

They teach their children about the savages fighting our soldiers. Lesser beings, devoid of morals empathy, and love. They teach their children to hate, and to fear the savages. One boy in particular is so invigorated, that he makes it a goal of his to ship off join the fight as soon as he can Three years later, at the ripe age of sixteen, the boy boards a vessel along with fifty thousand other soldiers and begins his trek to the battlefield.

When the boy arrives, he takes a look around and immediately realizes that things are not as advertised. There is no war. There are no savage beasts, and there is no raging battle they are waging. There is, however, an extermination of massive proportions underway.

The boy quickly realizes the native beings are not a fighting people. Bullets fly in one direction only, and that is away from the humans. The boy is appalled by his revelations, and is quick to share them.

So he tells his peers that the war they fight is no war at all, that they are not soldiers. They are pest control. The native lifeforms do not attempt to fight back in the slightest, and yet they carry on with their relentless slaughter.
The boy’s peers listen. They listen, and absorb every word the boy says. The boy is then mocked. He is ridiculed, and he is framed as a sympathizer. He seeks out a higher power, just to be shot back to the ground. He doesn’t give up his fight, and is disliked more and more amongst his peers.

One day, during an explosives test, the boy was tasked with placing the charges. Before he had a chance to get far enough away, the soldier in charge of the test hit the detonator prematurely. It was an accident, the squad says.

Innocence and conscience were incinerated, and morality was lost. And somehow, when the war was over, humanity further spun their web. In another hundred years, they moved on.

title: Manifest Destiny [SF/SP]

question: What does the story say about humanity?

answer: Humanity has been searching for a new hope for their people for a century. They found a new world and sent people to go there. When they arrived, they found the land was already claimed by a people unknown to humanity. The humans provoked the indigenous people and they retaliated. They had to wage war against the savages. A boy in particular is made to join the fight when he is 16. When he gets there, he realizes there is no war, but an extermination of massive proportions is underway. The savages are not fighting back.

critique: The highlighted portion of the answer is incorrect and should be omitted.

critique: The boy realizes there is no war, but the savages are not fighting back because they are being exterminated.

critique: The answer should mention the boy's fate.

critique: The answer does not mention the general attitude of humanity.

critique: It's omitted that humanity views the indigenous population on the new world as savage, devoid of morals, empathy, and love, teaching their children to hate and fear the "savages".

critique: The boy's realization that there is no war is not relevant to the question.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

question: What does the story say about space-faring civilizations in general?

answer: No answer

critique: The response misses to provide an answer to the task.


text:
The hopeless prayers from the begging mortals on The Planet beneath the weak and wide-awake Oracle stung Him as He wept to the chirps of songbirds flying through the sky around. The Oracle could not hold His composure any longer. The clouds crashed together, and downward lightning broke through horizons of soils that had been left untouched for millions of years. The Oracle stepped down onto The Planet, looked about His creation, and took a large uneven breathe. Today, His masterpiece looked beautiful to Him, but as He began echoing through the muse of the fractured and beaten, asking His creatures that He created long ago to eye, and listen for one final time, His brief-bliss ended. 'I am sorry My children, but today is the End of Days. The promise I made for you, a life in eternal peace and joy, has been broken. I cannot care for you anymore, and your prayers will no longer be answered. You will all forget what was, and will no longer be' said The Oracle. He planned on whispering the message to the mortals, but their petrified and war-torn faces made it seem that He had screamed like The Mad One did during the first-false-apocalypse. The drums of ambient mist subsided through and in between dark dens, crests and villages, and all that moved east and west with the rivers and winds cried for mercy, but no answer was returned as the Mighty One ascended back to His shattered throne. The words The Oracle spoke kissed the entire world to sleep, and The Good Teacher the mortals called him millenniums ago, ended His love in a mere moment. The Oracle wept at his closing remarks, as He never wanted to leave them dying in fear.

The Planet fell through an endless-expansion towards the entropic boundary, and flashed out of existence. The Oracle followed just behind The Planet, and into The Void underneath the entropic-boundary, where He met its Gatekeeper, standing perpetuate and looking away. 'I’m sorry, My good one. I need Your friendship now, more than ever. I am dying, and so are You. We have to leave. We must end this. Please, forgive Me.' said The Oracle. The Gatekeeper turned and looked at Her Brother with a flavor only the Masters of Sorrow would know. She stared with vehemence at Her Brother’s weak posture. She dreamed of this day. She wanted revenge. She walked like venom over to Her Brother, who turned away like a cowardice lamb about to be slaughtered. But as she peered into her small younger Brother, who shook and looked indifferent from any other poor mortal boy, She knew that Their Work was absolute, finished and over. Her fury subsided, and with a silent ease, leaned Her bloodied head on Her Brother’s shoulder, and as soft as She could without collapsing, cried for the first time since Her sentence. 'Let’s go home friend. Let’s start over. Your eternal punishment is over' said The Oracle in scattered breathes. The Void vanished in beat with time’s outro, and the two Creators left the remaining fabric pulsing, flowing, and isostatic. The Oracle and The Gatekeeper exited the testing chamber with Their heads hung down, each with distinct scents of misery. But before the Two ended Their experiment, They looked into each-other’s divine eyes, nodded and hugged once more. 'I promise no more pain' whispered The Oracle into His Sister’s ear, and in a shine and great flicker, the room disappeared, Their constructed existence ceased, and the hum of all that ever was in Their Universe laughed back into eternity. The Creators’ long simulation had ended, and They were on their way back Home to deliver their findings.

title: [Critique Wanted] "The End of the Experiment" (635 words)

question: Summarize the source of tension in the story.

answer: The tension in the story comes from the fact that the Oracle is breaking his promise to the mortals. He is telling them that he cannot care for them anymore and that their prayers will no longer be answered. He is also leaving them to die in fear.

critique: "He is also leaving them" should be singular "is also leaving them"

critique: The answer should mention that the planet is also destroyed.

critique: The answer should mention that the Oracle is leaving them to die in fear because he is dying.

critique: The answer should mention that the Oracle and the Gatekeeper are leaving the planet.

critique: The answer should mention the Gatekeeper.

critique: It is omitted that the Gatekeeper is angry at the Oracle because of his weakness.

text: The answer should mention that the Gatekeeper is also dying along with the Oracle.

question: Summarize the roles of good and evil throughout the story.

answer: In the beginning of the story, good is destroyed by the words of evil. Evil assumes victory for the brief moments of triumph until The Oracle Strikes back the good way. On the second round evil is defeated by the redeeming powers of good when the Gatekeeper helps the Oracle rise. The ending is an exercise in good-versus-evil from which good wins by sparing evil from eternal death.

critique: One line is too much for such a confused take

critique: "On the second round evil is defeated by the redeeming powers of good when the Gatekeeper helps the Oracle rise." - this is incorrect. The Gatekeeper was already on the side of good and helped the Oracle out of pity.

critique: The story does not mention the Gatekeeper helping the Oracle rise.

critique: The answer is confusing and nonsensical.

critique: The story does not really have a clear good and evil. Instead, it is about the end of a cycle of creation.

question: Explain how and why The Oracle's creation had come to this point of no return.

answer: The planet's creatures no longer wished to pray to the Oracle, they wanted to live in perpetual fear. They wanted to experience death and lose the feeling of peace and bliss. The Oracle's whisper of a broken promise can be seen as their lack of thanks or their need to shave a little off the human senses.

critique: This doesn't make a lot of sense (and in this author's opinion, doesn't really work on any merits) as such; it would've made more sense to just attribute it to a " fallen " planet.


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John MacAndrew bent to the ground, picking up the last piece of wood, he placed it with the others.  John's wife sent him out to the woods to find firewood for the night.

On his way back to the farm, John noticed three men in the woods, traveling down an animal made path.  John was expecting them.  Reivers who where sent out to find John and kill him.  Reivers where raiders along the Scottish/English border consisting of both nationalities.  John had earlier joined forces with the Ross clan who where pursuing a group of reivers who had stolen the cattle of the Ross Clan.  John was one archer of supreme skill and made a name for himself killing reivers with his bow.  At the end of the pursuit, John pulled out his bow and struck the Chief reiver in the eye.

As the men walked down the path they noticed a young man carrying a bundle of wood.  The young man was not a tall one, actually he was rather short in stature, and seemed to have trouble carrying the wood as he stumbled and dropped one piece after another.
"You there boy," the reiver said.  "Do you know a John MacAndrew?"
"I know him," John said.  "I'm the servant."
"I need you to show us where he lives."
"Not sure if I can do that, he doesn't like visitors."
What a surprise, thought the reivers.  John MacAndrew was known for his run-ins with border raiders and was constantly in danger from one seeking a vendetta.
"Tell you what," one of the reivers said.  "I will give you two shillings if you bring us to MacAndrew."
"Two shillings? I guess I could take you to his house."
They followed the boy up the path to a small farm and up to the farm house.  The house was not much to look at, at most it looked like it held two rooms.  Outside the house was an old oak tree, it looked as if it been there for centuries.

Claire MacAndrew placed the last log into the fireplace.  She sat at the large table at the center of the room, the table itself almost took up the entire room, leaving little space to walk.  Where is he?  John should be home by now, thought Claire.  It was a cold night and the fire would not last much longer.  There was a knock on the door.  Claire got up from her seat and opened the small wooden door.  Standing outside was her husband and three large men.  John took off his hat and held it with both hands.
"Excuse me Ms,"  John said.  "Is your husband around?"
"He ran off about an hour ago, but he should be around here somewhere."
Claire and her husband had many encounters with reivers.  She knew all about the dangers that seemed to follow John wherever he went.  Once again she would have to help John escape his troubles.  Where would he be without me?  Dead, perhaps, thought Claire.
"Would you like to come in?"
"Do you have food?" said one of the reivers.
"We always have food for guests, please sit down."
The reivers one by one walk in and sat down at the table.  John also walked it with his hat still in hand as he stood patently by the door.
"Samuel,"  Claire turned to John.  "Go fetch the master,  I think he went to check on the cows."
"Yes Ms."
With a smile John put his hat back on and ran out the door, closing the door behind him.

Once outside, John made his way to the barn located behind the house.  The barn was where the MacAndrew's kept farm equipment and newly slaughtered animals.  Inside there was a newly killed cow.  John placed the cow on his shoulder and carried it back to the house.  Placing the cow against the door, with the flesh side up, made it more of a challenge to open the door from the inside.  John turned around to face the old oak tree.  My favorite tree, thought John as he started to climb.  About six meters up, John reached into a hollow crevice within the tree.  He pulled out a bow and a quiver with a supply of arrows.

Placing three cups on the table, Claire poured water for each of the three men at the table.
"I thought you had food."
"I'm bringing you food, I thought you would want some water first."
At the far end of the house Claire opened the pantry where she stored a small provision of food.  She gathered a arm full of small whole wheel size of cheese.
"I hope you all like cheese."
"Cheese?" said one man.  "She has cheese!"
"A whole wheel of cheese." Claire said.  She made her way over to the men, still seated, eagerly awaiting the first meal in half a day of travel.  While walking to the reivers she slipped and fell onto the newly swept dirt floor.  The balls of cheese bounced and rolled away from her in every direction.  The three men all in a hurry flew from their seats and dived for the cheese, fighting each other for the food.  As if they where rodents, desperate for food, crammed the food into their own mouths as if there was no time to chew.  Suddenly the room was filled with the cry of the young man.
"MacAndrew is coming!"  the boy yelled.  "John MacAndrew is on his way!"
The men struggled to get to their feet.  One choked as he tried to spit a large piece of cheese from his mouth.  They rushed for the door, but there was something pressing against the small wooden door, slowing their escape.

John watched as if someone was struggling to open the door.  The fresh cow carcass was doing what he wished.  John pulled out an arrow from his quiver.  Pulled back on his bow, aimed at the door and waited.  The door slowly by little budged open more and more.  A large jut finally flew the door open as the carcass fell in front of the door with the skinned side facing upwards.  The first of the reivers rushed out.  He slipped on the skinned carcass and landed on his back.  John released his first arrow.  The arrow struck the man in the neck entering from the lower part of the neck and traveled upwards towards the skull.  Reiver number two emerged from the farm house, sword in hand.  He looked around, as if he was scanning his surroundings.  John released his second arrow.  The reiver looked upwards towards the oak tree.  The arrow struck the man in the head, killing him instantly.  The third and final reiver staggered out, still choking on his piece of cheese roll, sword in hand.  The third arrow left John MacAndrew's bow.  Striking the man in the spleen.  The man fell as he screamed in agony.  John released a fourth arrow.  Hitting the man in the stomach, followed by a fifth arrow to the chest.

John placed his quiver of arrows and bow back into the crevice of the old oak tree.  As the climbed back down his wife came out to see what had happened.
"You know they will send more men to find you."
"Let them come,"  John said.  "They are not the first, and they will not be the last raiders I kill."
"Don't you think it would be wise to move north?"  Claire said.  "I mean--away from the border, away from the cattle raiders?"
"Why?  John asked.  "This is our home.  If they want to steal my cattle and my way of living they will have to get past me first.  I'm not going to be chased away from my home."
"I'm just not sure how many times I can get you out of trouble John."
"Don't worry, I'm the best archer this place has ever seen.  I'm not going anywhere soon."

title: John MacAndrew & the Reivers

question: How does John trick the three Reivers when they come upon him collecting wood?

answer: He tells them he is the servant and takes them to his house.

critique: He also pretends to be sent to find the master.

critique: He also pretends to go get his master, but the reivers don't fall for it.

critique: "He tells them he is the servant and takes them to his house." - this is inaccurate. While "he" is the servant, John immediately revealed he knew John through the reivers' question. He said he would take them to his master's house, but John had an alternate plan on how to get rid of the men. Correct the answer to reflect what really happened.

critique: The answer could include more details about how he fools them.

critique: It is omitted that John tells them that his master is not around and that he will take them to him.

critique: The answer should mention that John pretends that he is going to get his master.

critique: It is omitted that John tells them he will bring them to his master and runs off.

critique: It is omitted that John tells them that he will take them to John if they give him money, which they do.

question: Where did John learn his archery skills

answer: It is unclear where John learned his archery skills.

critique: It is clear where John learned his archery skills.

critique: "It is unclear where John learned his archery skills." - is incorrect. John learned his archery skills from his father.

critique: In two sentences of its presence, a total of three locations feature prominently in the narrative.

critique: It is not unclear where John learned his archery skills.

critique: The text implies that John's archery skills are a result of his being a cattle-raider.


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SISYRIDAE, commonly known as SPONGEFLIES or SPONGILLAFLIES, are a family of winged insects in the order Neuroptera. There are approximately 60 living species described, and several extinct species identified from the fossil record.

Description

[Forewing venation of _Sisyra nigra_] In general appearance, the adults resemble some brown lacewings (Hemerobiidae). The forewings of spongillaflies have a span of 4–10 millimetres. The greyish or brownish wings have few cross veins except in the costal field, and most of these are not forked. The subcostal (Sc) and radial (R1) veins are fused near the wingtip.

The larvae of spongillaflies look rather bizarre. Similar to those of some osmylids (Osmylidae) at first glance, they have spindly legs on a bulky thorax, long antennae, and flexible, threadlike mouthparts. However, the second and third instars carry seven pairs of jointed, movable tracheal gills beneath their plump abdomen. These gills are possessed by no other extant insect family, and readily distinguish them from osmylid larvae.

Ecology and life cycle

[Cocoon and pupa.] Adult spongillaflies are crepuscular or nocturnal. They are omnivores, sometimes hunting small invertebrates, but mainly scavenging on such animals' carcasses, as well as on pollen and honeydew.

The females deposit their eggs singly or as small clutches on plants that droop over freshwater lakes or slow-moving rivers. A protective web is spun to cover the eggs. When the larvae hatch, they drop down into the water where they develop until pupation. They use their mouthparts to parasitize Spongillidae freshwater sponges (e.g. of the genus _Spongilla_, hence the name “spongillaflies”) and Phylactolaemata freshwater bryozoans by stinging into the host animals' body and sucking out cell contents. The antennae are stouter than they look and are used to aid in locomotion. Development to pupation takes between several weeks and one year.

[_Sisyra_ sp. larva] Spongillafly larvae leave the water and go to hidden places nearby to pupate, choosing locations like beneath rocks or behind tree bark. They spin a cocoon for pupation, but in temperate climates they overwinter in the cocoon as larvae, pupating only the following spring.

Systematics and taxonomy

Spongillaflies were formerly placed in the Osmyloidea, as their closest relatives were held to be the osmylids (Osmylidae) and the Nevrorthidae. This was due to the similar adaptations of the larvae of spongillaflies and osmylids. But this is apparently due to convergent evolution; actually, the spongillaflies seem to be closer to the brown lacewings (Hemerobiidae) than to the osmylids, but even more closely related to the dusty wings (Coniopterygidae). And even though they are not often placed in the superfamily Coniopterygoidea yet, they most likely form a clade with the Coniopterygidae and thus it would seem that the Coniopterygoidea, rather than being an unnecessarily monotypic taxon, is expanded to signify that the spongillaflies and the dusty wings are each other's closest relatives.

A few fossil genera are known, mainly from the Eocene like _“Sisyra” amissa_ which may or may not be the first record of the living genus.[1] The genus _Cratosisyrops_, from the Aptian Crato Formation, was suggested to be a spongillafly member, but later authors Perkovsky and Makarkin in 2015 noted the fossil lacks details to confidently place it in the family. The oldest members of the family are species in the subfamily Paradoxosisyrinae [2] from Cenomanian Burmese amber and _Prosisyrina_ from Santonian Taimyr amber.[3][4]

The family is currently divided into two subfamilies with the four extant genera and two of the extinct genera placed into Sisyrinae, while five extinct genera are placed into the subfamily Paradoxosisyrinae.[5]

SISYRIDAE

-   †Paradoxosisyrinae
    -   †_Buratina_[6]
    -   †_Khobotun_[7]
    -   †_Paradoxosisyra_
    -   †_Protosiphoniella_[8]
    -   †_Sidorchukatia_[9]
-   Sisyrinae
    -   _Climacia_
    -   †_Paleosisyra_
    -   †_Prosisyrina_
    -   _Sisyborina_
    -   _Sisyra_
    -   _Sisyrina_

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title: Sisyridae

question: Summarize the most interesting facts about the sisyridae.

answer: The larvae of spongillaflies look rather bizarre. The larvae are omnivores, sometimes hunting small invertebrates, but mainly scavenging on such animals' carcasses, as well as on pollen and honeydew. The females deposit their eggs singly or as small clutches on plants that droop over freshwater lakes or slow-moving rivers. A protective web is spun to cover the eggs. When the larvae hatch, they drop down into the water where they develop until pupation. They use their mouthparts to parasitize Spongillidae freshwater sponges and Phylactolaemata freshwater bryozoans by stinging into the host animals' body and sucking out cell contents. The antennae are stouter than they look and are used to aid in locomotion. Development to pupation takes between several weeks and one year.

critique: The answer should mention that the larvae are placed in the subfamily Paradoxosisyrinae.

critique: The answer is a copy-and-paste of the article.

critique: The last two sentences of the response do not contain any interesting facts about the sisyridae. They should be removed.

critique: The response includes extraneous information.

critique: The answer is a summary of the article, not a summary of the most interesting facts.

critique: The ecology and life cycle section is irrelevant.


text:
A short white flash, then darkness. When the room started to become visible again the walls were close, too close to be comfortable. But this was not the first time. Seb knew what to do.

"Get up." He said it slowly, commanding himself to expand, just the way he had trained it. But even after so many times it still didn't work.
"Get up! Get up! Get up!"

Finally his body began to expand, legs protruded from his limb round torso, fingertips slowly pushed through the rubbery sides, reshaping the ball in an incomplete star. Finally his eyes began to move upwards and with them the room began to expand. Not just upwards, as it always did, this time it also expanded to the sides, the way Subject 3 had described it.

Seb would have had a smile on his lips, if he had had a face, but it was still beginning to form. His body was still just an egg-shape with spikes at the bottom and sides.

While suppressing the pain that his tearing skin signaled to his brain he thought to himself that this must be what giving birth feels like. Maybe he should stop making jokes about women after all.

After an hour of effort he had shaped all of his hands and the stumps of his arms nearly up to the elbows. The right hand protruded further than the left, and it also felt bigger. But was that really the right? He wasn't sure on which side his eyes would end up.

The team had warned him against trying too much at once, but all went smoothly and so Anton decided to try his luck. Exerting pressure on what felt like his stomach or lungs, he slowly pressed downwards and ignored the feeling of ripping tissue that accompanied the push.

His legs formed quicker than his arms. He already had his knees completely shaped before he refocused on his arms, bit his unformed lip and pushed to painfully protrude the bigger part of his right biceps. Through trial and error - getting the angle right was still not easy - he finally managed to shape his right shoulder. That was a first.

The left shoulder formed quickly and he barely felt the torn skin. There was a disturbing feeling - a sound, or maybe a smell - but that was maybe just a normal event at this level, after all he was one of the first to reach this state.

Shifting his focus again to his legs he pushed harder on his stomach and was surprised that his legs seemed to be surrounded by a slimy and warm texture. Despite, or maybe beause of the gentle lubrication, his legs kept forming with relative ease. Muscles and bones smoothly moved into place, even the pain seemed to fade away.

He felt a slight pressure on his shoulder and there was distinct chattering in the background, but he was too far to stop. His legs were nearly complete, his hips clicking into place for the first time and it was time to push harder to form his head. But a white flash interrupted him.

"Aaaaaaaaahhhhhhhh!!"

The sudden scream scared Seb and made him scream even louder. It took him a few moments to be back in the world, to remember that breathing was normal and that the water he could hear rushing through his ears was just the blood his heart was pumping around his body. Then the stench hit him, sour with a note of curry and bile.

The lab assistant, Mark, stood smiling at his side. He didn't seem to mind the vomit.

"You got far this time, didn't you?"

"Yeah, I was nearly complete!" Anton was proud of his accomplishment. "Why did you pull me out?"

Mark hesitated. "Do you have any idea how long you were in there?" Anton responded with a frown. "It was six hours, and you threw up on yourself a while ago. We had to get you out."

After cleaning the largest pieces off with dry tissues Seb stood up on his shaking legs and signed the registration sheet. The young female researcher whose name he just never seemed to be able to remember handed him €120. She smiled at him. "Well done." He looked at her nametag. 'Sarah'.

"Thanks, Sarah." Seb turned and walked out.

"Well done." He repeated to himself on the way out into the cold autumn day.

***
*Critique welcome*

title: Subject 4 [Chapter/short short]

question: What organs does Seb try to generate?

answer: Seb tries to generate his arms, legs, and head.

critique: He also tries to generate his torso and hips.

critique: It is omitted that he also tries to generate his torso.

critique: The answer should be a complete sentence.

critique: It is incorrect that he created his head.

question: Describe the setting of the story.

answer: It is not clear where the story takes place. It appears that the story takes place in a lab.

critique: The story takes place in a lab, but it is not clear where the lab is located.

critique: It is not clear where the story takes place. It appears that the story takes place in a lab.

critique: It is stated that the story takes place in a lab.


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MARTIN (17[1]/19[2] December 1406 – August 1407[3]) was heir apparent to the throne of Sicily. He was a member of the House of Barcelona.

Life

He was the son and heir apparent of Martin I, King of Sicily. His mother was Blanche, who became Queen of Navarre in 1425. His parents got married on 26 November 1402.[4] Queen Blanche's first pregnancy had ended in miscarriage.[5] Nevertheless, the young queen's second pregnancy was successful, and he was born on 17[6] or 19[7] December 1406 in Sicily. He was baptized Martin after his father and grandfather, King Martin of Aragon, who informed the maternal grandfather, King Charles III of Navarre, of the birth.[8]

Martin's grandaunt Violant of Bar, queen dowager of Aragon, proposed an engagement to her brother-in-law, King Martin the Elder, between their grandchildren, the new-born Martin and her granddaughter, Marie of Anjou.[9] in order to see her offspring on the Aragonese throne.[10]

The little prince, however, died few months later on August 1407 in Sicily.[11] Not only the dowager queen's hopes failed but the continuity of the House of Barcelona was at risk. Few years later the royal branch of the House of Barcelona became extinct in legitimate male line.

Notes

Bibliography

-   Lo Forte Scirpo, Maria Rita: _C'era una volta una regina... : due donne per un regno: Maria d'Aragona e Bianca di Navarra_, Napoli, Liguori, 2003.
-   Fodale, Salvatore: Blanca de Navarra y el gobierno de Sicilia, _Príncipe de Viana_ _60_, 311–322, 1999. URL: See External links
-   Silleras-Fernández, Núria: Spirit and Force: Politics, Public and Private in the Reign of Maria de Luna (1396–1406), In: Theresa Earenfight (ed.): _Queenship and Political Power in Medieval and Early Modern Spain_, Ashgate, 78–90, 2005. , 9780754650744 URL: See External links
-   Miron, E. L.: _The Queens of Aragon: Their Lives and Times_, London, Stanley Paul & Co, 1913. URL: See External links
-   Tramontana, Salvatore: Il matrimonio con Martino: il progetto, i capitoli, la festa, _Príncipe de Viana_ _60_, 13–24, 1999. URL: See External links
-   Silleras-Fernández, Núria: Widowhood and Deception: Ambiguities of Queenship in Late Medieval Crown of Aragon, In: Mark Crane et al. (eds.): _Shell Games: Studies in Scams, Frauds and Deceits (1300–1650)_, CRRS Publications, Toronto, 2004, 185–207. URL: See External links

[1] See Fodale (1999: 316–317).

[2] See Tramontana (1999: 16).

[3] See Tramontana (1999: 16) and Fodale (1999: 316–317).

[4] See Fodale (1999: 315).

[5] See Tramontana (1999: 16)

[6] See Fodale (1999: 316–317).

[7] See Tramontana (1999: 16)

[8] See Fodale (1999: 316–317).

[9] In 1422 she married King Charles VII of France.

[10] See Silleras-Fernández (2004: 195).

[11] See Tramontana (1999: 16) and Fodale (1999: 316–317).

title: Martin of Aragon (heir of Sicily)

question: What is the term for the kind of marriage that Martin and Marie were intended to have?

answer: A planned marriage, one that is carefully arranged between or by families of influence.

critique: The answer is a sentence that is far too long to be an answer to the question. Moreover, it contains multiple statements instead of just one.

critique: The answer should be more specific about the kind of arranged marriage.

critique: Does not explain that the union didn't happen

critique: "one that is carefully arranged" - replace with "a planned"

critique: The answer could be phrased as a complete sentence.

critique: The answer should be more specific about the kind of arranged marriage it is.

critique: The answer should mention that the young royals were first cousins.

critique: The answer should mention the term "arranged marriage"

critique: The response is not related to the question.

critique: "one that is carefully arranged between or by families of influence." - change it to "marriage between cousins"

critique: The answer could be clearer in its use of terminology.

text: The response should say that the question is not answered, because the passage does not define the term for the marraige.

category: other

refinement: A planned marriage, one that is carefully arranged between or by families of influence.

category_text: passage does not answer question

question: What did Martin's death effectively end?

answer: The goal of the dowager queen Violant of Bar to have her offspring on the Aragonese throne

critique: The answer does not fully explain the fact that the royal branch of the House of Barcelona became extinct in a legitimate male line.

critique: The answer is misleading, there is no evidence that this had a negative outcome on the House of Barcelona.

critique: The answer should mention that the House of Barcelona became extinct in the male line.

critique: There is no mention of Violant being Martin's grandmother

critique: The answer should mention the House of Barcelona.

critique: While this answer is sufficient it is not grammatical.

critique: The answer does not mention the continuity of the House of Barcelona.

critique: "The goal of the dowager queen Violant of Bar to have her offspring on the Aragonese throne" - the answer is inaccurate. Martin died in infancy so it can't be said that he "effectively end[ed] the goal of the dowager queen Violant of Bar to have her offspring on the Aragonese throne." The correct answer is "The continuity of the House of Barcelona was at risk."

critique: The answer could be clearer in its pronoun use.

critique: "The goal of the dowager queen Violant of Bar" - is inaccurate. It should be "continuity of the House of Barcelona".

critique: The answer should mention the continuity of the House of Barcelona.

critique: The demise of Martin did not have an effect on the House of Barcelona.

question: How long did Martin spend on this earth?

answer: Four months, apparently.

critique: Needs to specify the observation was made by the author due to lack of evidence.

critique: It is not explicitly stated that he died after four months.

critique: "Four months, apparently." - this is irrelevant.

critique: The passage does not say, but he died in August 1407.

critique: The answer should note that the passage does not state the age of Martin at the time of his death.

critique: Martin died in 1407 but he was allegedly born on December 17, 1406.

text: The answer should say that Martin lived for 9 months.

category: accuracy

refinement: Four months, apparently.

question: Which text might suggest Martin's birth was faked for the sake of an heir within the Barcelona lineage?

answer: No answer

critique: No text in the passage could suggest this possibility.

critique: Doesn't answer the question, says another text would suggest the birth wasn't faked, but Martin's birth was faked.

critique: Blanche was the Queen of Navarre, not Barcelona.

critique: The answer is empty, which means it is not answered.

critique: No answer is given, however, the text strongly hints it.


text:
Katie asked Artie to meet her at the Mexican restaurant, the bright yellow, stucco building just down the street from her house. It was a place they often went to eat. Artie sat on the plastic bench across the table from Katie. Katie’s blue eyes looked larger, even more beautiful than usual. But though her eyes were wide, they had less depth.  It was as if the deep pools of her eyes had dried up, leaving pure calcite rings of white and shallow puddles of blue that had once been seas.

Artie stared down at the table top. The surface was brown formica with a fake pattern of wood grain. He looked up at Katie, she brushed a lock of her auburn hair away from her face.

“Are things going to be OK between us?” Artie said, his voice was flat.

“I don’t think so” Katie said.

“What did I do wrong?”

“Nothing” Katie said. Her voice was flat too, but it had an edge like anger.  It wasn’t anger, “It’s over between us. You left some of your stuff at my house. I put it in a box on the porch, you can come get it whenever”.

Artie’s right hand was gripping a little plastic arch with the number “12” on it.  Just then a voice came over the intercom,

“Number 12”, the voice said.

Artie moved to slide off the bench and stood up, he looked down at Katie. “Are you going to stay and eat?”

“No” she pulled her purse over her shoulder and slid off the bench and stood up.  For a moment she and Artie stood close to each other. It didn’t help that she looked unusually beautiful.  Artie didn’t reach for her.  Even the habit of a parting embrace had dried up, his insides felt dried up. He stood feeling awkward for a moment. She looked very straight and dignified. Suddenly perfect. Then she turned and crossed the restaurant toward the door.  Artie’s eyes followed her as she pushed open the glass door and walked out into the parking lot. There was a big, arched window on either side of the door and he saw her as she crossed the parking lot. The warm March sun fell reddish on her hair.  It didn’t help that she looked very beautiful, even at a distance, walking across a parking lot.

“Number 12”, the scratchy intercom voice said again.

Artie went up to the counter and exchanged the plastic arch for a tray with their meals.  The tray held two lunch specials; tacos, enchiladas and piles of beans, orange rice and shredded, colorless lettuce.

Artie set the tray down on the table and picked at the food. Then he got up and walked to the restroom.  He cried a little bit in the bathroom stall then came back out.

When he came back from the bathroom, he saw one of the restaurant employees dumping the tray with the two lunch specials into a garbage can.  She looked up at him. She must have thought he was done eating.

Artie smiled at her vacantly and walked toward the exit.  He crossed the parking lot. That’s one thing that’s hard about being alone in the world, Artie thought as he got into his car; people throw your food away.

title: La Xalapena Mexican Restaurant, Savannah Georgia (550 words)

question: Why does the narrator feel such pain about his breakup with Katie?

answer: It is not clear from the text.

critique: It is clear that the narrator is a man who is in love and is heartbroken by the breakup.

critique: The answer is not clear from the text, but it is implied that the narrator is in love with Katie.

critique: It is clear from the text that he feels pain because he is alone and people throw his food away.


text:
John Snatch. Given name: Johnny Snatch. John Snatch sounds more professional though.

John worked in an office downtown. The office was on the third floor of
what used to be a grain storage building or something like that. John didn't care too much for the specifics, and certainly didn't pay much attention during the tour on his first day. He didn't even know the name of the offices above and below his.

Like him, his coworkers were young subscribers to the current urban fads and had certain sensitivities to the nonchalant method of doing things. Indie music that wasn't so indie anymore could often be heard throughout his office. No one wore khakis to work. A generation with an appreciation for themselves.
	His job was relatively unimportant, but necessary nonetheless. John was a secretary, and had his explanation for the peculiar job down pat. "Just trying to break those gender barriers," John would say, adding in a half-hearted attempt at a laugh. The truth was that John didn't care much for any job he could occupy his time with. He saw a certain level of the superficial in just about everything he did now. A somewhat nihilistic and apathetic attitude embraced him most of the time. He didn't understand why everyone couldn't just slow down.

Our story sets its self on the twenty-fifth of September, a day with a temperature of about 60 degrees. John walked out of his measly apartment, a paperback book tucked under his arm and messenger bag over his shoulder. He wore a white oxford shirt with an olive green sweater vest on top -the sleeves were half rolled up his forearm- his pants were brown and his shoes a different shade of the color. John had not opened his red and white paper back book in three days, but carried it along with him in unrecognized hopes that he could tell someone about it. He was about half way through, and mildly enjoyed the story. John's vocabulary was wide enough to make the plot seem much more interesting that it was, anyways.

On the bus, John found the usual urge to listen to music off of his mobile phone absent. Today was an overcast day, a day to stare out of the window of your bus silently as if you're conceptualizing your new novel, or maybe considering the human condition by forcing the rain in to some complex metaphor for which it was never intended. John exited a stop early and unconsciously decided to not go in to work that day.

The stop happened to be in front of an old, yet hip (by the new definition) bookstore and coffee shop. John had never noticed it before, but ducked in for no particular reason. He ordered his coffee, a mocha, no whipped cream, and walked around the bookstore. John dodged the regular titles found at all stores that at least turn a regular profit, catering to the likes of teenagers that needed a copy of Crime and Punishment with a foreword that would write their reports for them. John immediately looked for the most dust covered shelf.

On it, John found an odd assortment of literature, they were not in alphabetical order, nor in any order of genre or style. Not by color, size, rating, rarity. Although, something about many of them spiked familiarity in John. He picked up a book titled "Amy Rhinehart, the girl." This was odd. The girl in cubicle twenty-two was named Amy Rhinehart. He guessed it was an odd enough named to be used in a book. He opened to the first page. "Amy Rhinehart was born on the seventeenth of June, 1982." John looked up from the book, starting in to the shelves who, if by some sort of magic could transform in to a mirror, John would have seen the most puzzled look that ever wrote itself upon a man's face. Amy Rhinehart -the real one, from the office- was born June 17, 1982. He had read it in a personnel file just a day before. Surely he had misread.

Nope. The paper in front of him still printed the same thing he had seen moments before. "Odd." John thought. He put the book on the shelf, not wanting to scare himself any farther. He scanned the rows again, and as if by some spell saw a book titled, "Rob Snatch." His father's name. John couldn't help but express his confusion audibly. John began to reach for the novel, but before his hand could grasp its target, his eye found a new obsession. "The Mild Adventures of Johnny Snatch."

John asked the price of the book. It wasn't for sale. John stared at the cover for a moment, and opened the cover with the anticipation of a pirate, finding his lost gold contained in a chest within the bowels of a cave. John saw no text in this book, instead, he found a pen secured in a cut out of the pages. He picked the pen up, and while examining it, did not notice that the cutout ceased to exist. John looked back at the book, his mind was as blank as the pages before him.

The book wasn't for sale.
John ran out of the store, book and all.
No one stopped him.

title: First short story, 'John.' Feedback is greatly appreciated!

question: Summarize surprises in the plot.

answer: John is surprised to find a book about his coworker, Amy Rhinehart, in a bookstore. He is also surprised to find a book about his father, Rob Snatch. He is most surprised to find a book about himself, The Mild Adventures of Johnny Snatch.

critique: The answer omits the fact that the book about John is blank.

critique: The answer omits the fact that John takes the book.

critique: The answer omits John's discovery of a book about him.

critique: The answer omits the fact that John steals the book.

critique: The answer omits the book John finds that is not for sale.

critique: The answer omits the fact that John takes the book with him.

question: Summarize how John Snatch changes over the course of the story.

answer: John Snatch is a young nihilistic and apathetic person who doesn't care much for his job. He is a secretary and has an explanation for the peculiar job down pat. He doesn't care much for any job he could occupy his time with. He sees a certain level of the superficial in just about everything he does now. He doesn't understand why everyone couldn't just slow down. He is a person who doesn't care much.

critique: The answer contains a lot of information that is not relevant to the question.

critique: The answer should mention that John Snatch is a book.

critique: Says he doesn't care for any job and does have an explanation for the peculiar one; removes these lines about not believing in any job for the sake of science.

critique: The answer is a summary of the story, not of John's character.

critique: The answer is a summary of the story, not a description of John's character.

critique: The answer should mention that John is intrigued by the book he finds in the bookstore.

question: Summarize the plot of the paperback John has tucked under his arm.

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should be that the plot is not revealed.

question: What does the story say about John and his coworkers?

answer: John and his coworkers are young subscribers to the current urban fads and had certain sensitivities to the nonchalant method of doing things. They didn't wear khakis to work. John's coworkers are also nihilistic and apathetic.

critique: The answer should mention that John is a secretary.

critique: It's omitted that John's coworkers had an appreciation for themselves,

critique: The answer omits the fact that John is a secretary.

critique: It's omitted that John's coworkers are also somewhat superficial.


text:
Prosecutors dropped all charges Wednesday against three Baltimore police officers accused in the arrest and death of Freddie Gray, bringing to an end one of the highest-profile criminal cases in the city's history with zero convictions.

Baltimore State's Attorney Marilyn J. Mosby acknowledged the long odds of securing convictions in the remaining cases following the acquittals of three other officers on similar though more serious charges.

In a hearing Wednesday meant to start the trial of Officer Garrett Miller, prosecutors dropped their cases against him, Officer William Porter and Sgt. Alicia White. Circuit Judge Barry G. Williams, who had acquitted the other officers, was expected to preside over the remaining trials as well.

After the most recent acquittal and "a great deal of thought and prayer," Mosby said, she resolved to drop the remaining charges. Mosby stood by her decision to bring the charges, pointing out that the medical examiner's office ruled Gray's death a homicide and that it's her job as the city's top prosecutor to seek justice.

"It's something that I've been grappling with for some time," Mosby said of her decision to end the prosecution, during an interview with The Baltimore Sun. "It's not something that was overnight."

Attorney Ivan Bates, who represents White and spoke on behalf of the defense teams, described the past year as a "nightmare" for the officers, who did not speak. He reiterated the defense argument that the officers didn't have anything to do with Gray's death, which they have characterized as a tragic accident.

"Not one of these officers woke up wanting to do anything negative to anyone," Bates said.

Gray's death has reverberated across Baltimore and the country at a time of national debate over the deaths of young black men in altercations with police. Gray, 25, died of severe neck injuries suffered in the back of a police van. He'd been shackled and handcuffed, but not secured in a seat belt.

Mostly peaceful protests erupted in Baltimore and lasted for days following his death. Then, on the day of his funeral, rioting, looting and arson broke out — and images of Baltimore in chaos were broadcast to an international audience.

Mosby charged the six Baltimore officers days later with offenses ranging from second-degree depraved-heart murder to manslaughter, reckless endangerment and misconduct in office.

The case pitted Mosby against police, and their verbal sparring Wednesday raised questions about their ability to cooperate going forward. The Fraternal Order of Police accused Mosby of pursuing a malicious and wrong-headed prosecution, while she accused police investigators of sabotage.

The case proved costly for the city.

The state's attorney's office and Police Department, which bought riot gear and paid officers overtime in anticipation of protests, spent an estimated $7.4 million on the trials, city officials said Wednesday. In addition, the city reached a $6.4 million settlement last year with Gray's family.

Under the broad theory of the case, the prosecution argued that the officers acted unreasonably, willfully disregarding their training and general orders, when they didn't secure Gray in a seat belt in the back of a police transport van and failed to get him medical help.

Prosecutors said those decisions led to Gray's death. They also argued that the officers had no probable cause to stop Gray and that Goodson, the van's driver, had given Gray a "rough ride."

All of the officers pleaded not guilty. Their attorneys argued that they acted reasonably and professionally and that the prosecution had no evidence to support the charges.

Williams, a former city prosecutor who investigated police misconduct for the U.S. Department of Justice, repeatedly questioned the legal theories put forth by prosecutors.

The trial of Porter ended with a hung jury and a mistrial in December, and Williams acquitted Officers Edward Nero and Caesar Goodson and Lt. Brian Rice after bench trials in May, June, and July, respectively.

Porter had been scheduled to be retried in September, and White had been scheduled to be tried in October.

At the conclusion of Wednesday's hearing, which lasted minutes, Williams lifted a standing gag order that had barred everyone involved in the case from speaking about it publicly. That led to dueling news conferences.

Mosby headed to the West Baltimore neighborhood where Gray had been arrested and stood on the sidewalk to explain her decision and to rail against the criminal justice system.

Mosby blamed a number of factors for her inability to secure a conviction, including having to rely on the Police Department to investigate its own and not having a say in whether the cases proceeded in front of a judge or jury. Under Maryland law, defendants get to pick a judge or jury.

"For those that believe I'm anti-police, it's simply not the case. I'm anti-police brutality," she said. "The only loss and the greatest loss in all of this was that of Freddie Gray's life.

"As a mother, the decision not to proceed on these trials, these remaining trials, is agonizing," she added. "However, as a chief prosecutor elected by the citizens of Baltimore, I must consider the dismal likelihood of conviction at this point."

She noted the "countless sacrifices" of her prosecutors in the case, including Chief Deputy State's Attorney Michael Schatzow and Deputy State's Attorney Janice Bledsoe, and said her office will continue to "fight for a fair and equitable justice system for all."

Gray's stepfather, Richard Shipley, said family members "stand behind Marilyn and her prosecuting team, and my family is proud to have them represent us."

"It was wrong what they did to my son," said Gray's mother, Gloria Darden.

Shortly thereafter, the officers, their defense attorneys and leaders of the Fraternal Order of Police Lodge 3, the union that represents the officers and paid for their defense, held their own news conference.

"Everybody wanted to find out what happened to Freddie Gray," Bates said. "The Baltimore City Police, they did the investigation, and they said it was an accident. ... The Baltimore City state's attorney's office had an opportunity to do an in-depth investigation, and they did not."

Lt. Gene Ryan, the union president, said, "Justice has been done." He also described Mosby's comments at her news conference as "outrageous" and "uncalled for."

Ryan said he expects the six officers to return to work, though all of them face possible discipline. Administrative investigations into their actions on the day of Gray's arrest and death are being conducted by the Montgomery County Police Department, with assistance from Howard County police. Once those investigations conclude, Baltimore Police Commissioner Kevin Davis would decide any discipline.

Davis, in a statement issued Wednesday, called Mosby's decision to drop the charges "a wise one" that will help the city heal and move forward.

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"As the trials end and this chapter in Baltimore's history closes, it is important that we collectively resolve to direct our emotions in a constructive way to reduce violence and strengthen citizen partnerships," Davis said. "Any motives that fall short of that are counterproductive and inconsistent with the values of Baltimoreans."

The conclusion of the Gray case comes at a pivotal moment for Baltimore and police-community relations.

The Justice Department is expected to release soon the results of a wide-ranging civil-rights investigation into the Police Department. Such reviews in other cities have resulted in increased spending on policing and findings of shortcomings and misguided practices.

_Baltimore Sun reporters Justin Fenton and Pamela Wood contributed to this article._

-   Baltimore Police Department

question: Summarize Mosby's feelings about the case discussed in the text.

answer: Mosby is the Baltimore State's Attorney, and she is the one pursuing the case against the officers. She is criticized for the way she handled the case, but she stands by her decision. She says she is anti-police brutality, but not anti-police. She is not sure her office can secure a conviction in the future, and she is not sure she can trust the police to investigate their own misconduct.

critique: The answer should mention that Mosby is a mother.

text: The response missed out on other feelings Mosby had on the case.

question: Who would want to hire Mosby in the future to fight their case?

answer: Law firms.

critique: It is not stated that she would want to work for a law firm.

critique: This answer is incorrect and needs to be re-written.

critique: According to the passage, it may be assumed law firms won't hire her because of her former trials where she didn't win anything.

critique: There is no evidence to suggest that Mosby would be hired by law firms.

text: Mosby is the Attorney of Baltimore, she is eligible to take up any case within her jurisdiction.


text:
     "The city is in a state of chaos. Monsters run rampant and there's no safe place to hide. The only thing left for me to do is run. Or, if you're like me, head right into the blazing city to search for someone. Not just any "someone" mind you. I've had a bone to pick with this guy for eight years. I'll admit, however, I'm a damn fool for coming to the city alone." A creature's roar is heard nearby. "Damn," Skylar begins running. The creatures are closing in on her as she runs through the remains of the ruined city. As she turns a sharp corner she suddenly collides with another person. The man falls back frantic as he too was running for his life. "Watch it you bloody moron! You want to die in this shit hole!?" The rant stops short as Skylar recognizes the man she collided with. To her shock and delight, it was just the person she was looking for.
     "Bradford, Avery Bradford is right here in front of me, and yet I can't just enjoy my revenge. Not yet anyway..." The creatures that were chasing both Bradford and Skylar take their stance on overturned cars, waiting to pounce. Skylar slowly reaches for the revolver on her hip and the sawed-off on her back. Bradford sat crying into his palms, apparently not the man he once was eight years ago. The creatures growled and finally made their move. The one above Bradford pounced first. Skylar quickly unloaded her revolver into the creature and it crumpled in front of Bradford, nearly crushing him. She then turned, both hands on her sawed-off, and pulled the trigger twice. Both creatures heads turned into cloudy messes of crimson. Skylar sighed, loaded her shotgun and revolver, and kept her revolver in hand while strapping the shotgun to her back once more.
     Skylar turned her head and saw Bradford standing up slowly, obviously surprised at the events that had just taken place. He looked at the bodies of the creatures, then to Skylar who's face was covered by a car's high beams. He slowly made his way towards her smiling and thanking her, but stopped short when Skyler stepped out of the high beam's light. Bradford's face turned from delight to horror at the realization of who this woman was. "B-but how? Why? You're, you're supposed to be dead." Skylar smirked, "You mean just like my sister? Like my father? I'm surprised you recognize me, but I am glad you do. That just makes this whole situation better."
     Bradford kneeled before Skylar and began pleading to leave him be. "Please, I didn't want to do it. That was the old me. I was desperate. I've learned my lesson, you don't need to do anything more." Skylar lifted her revolver and placed it in-between Bradford's eyes. "You were desperate? Desperate enough to rape a girl? Desperate enough to kill a protective father? No, you just wanted to satisfy your own desires and now when you're on the other end of the barrel, you regret those decisions. Funny how different you are now from when I first saw you." Bradford lifted his hands up, "Please, just tell me, why would you save me if you were just gonna end up killing me?" Skylar leaned in closer to emphasize the point she wanted to make. "You really think, that after eight years of searching I'm gonna let some freak-show do my job for me?  No, this was personal, and I'm seeing this through to the end. That's why I saved you."
     Bradford closed his eyes and waited for the end. Skylar reasserted herself and clicked the safety off. "Hope you enjoyed the last eight years. Time to say goodbye." As she uttered her last word the trigger pulled and all went silent. Skylar wiped tears from her eyes. She let the revolver fall from her grasp and turned to walk into the night.

title: Killing Monsters

question: What does the text say about where the monsters came from?

answer: No answer

question: What does the text say about the narrator's vendetta?

answer: The narrator is seeking someone and she wants to finish her job. Only then can she free her mind from the burden of avenging her family.

critique: The answer should mention that the person she is seeking is Avery Bradford.

critique: She seeks revenge for an incident involving her sister and father.

critique: The narrator is Skylar, not the narrator.

critique: "The narrator is seeking someone and she wants to finish her job. Only then can she free her mind from the burden of avenging her family." - this is incorrect. The narrator was never burdened with avenging her family because she never lost anyone to Bradford. She just wants to see him dead for the crime he committed against her. Needs a complete rewrite.

question: What does the text say about the creatures?

answer: They roam around the ruined city and chase humans. Some of them eventually attack, and Skylar and Bradford kill them. Kevin reveals that Skylar tattooed a symbol that subdues the creatures on her sister's arm after her sister became the new bearer of the mark that subdues the creatures.

critique: The text doesn't say anything about Kevin revealing that Skylar tattooed a symbol that subdues the creatures on her sister's arm.

critique: This is false. Kevin doesn't tattoo a symbol that subdues the creatures. The text doesn't mention anything about a tattoo or Kevin in general. This should be removed.

critique: The text does not mention that Kevin revealed that Skylar tattooed a symbol that subdues the creatures on her sister's arm after her sister became the new bearer of the mark that subdues the creatures.

critique: The text does not say anything about Kevin revealing that Skylar tattooed a symbol that subdues the creatures on her sister's arm after her sister became the new bearer of the mark that subdues the creatures.