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Once upon a time, there was a dinosaur called Tort. Tort had a very good friend called Mick. They only knew each other for a couple of years but Tort and Mick were as thick as thieves. They went everywhere together and did everything together. Mick would do anything for Tort and so would Tort, though Tort was not very good at such stuff.

Tort was the kind of dinosaur with lots of horns and ridges on his body. Tort loved all of his horns and ridges. It made him very happy and proud of how sharp and rough and how colourful they were. Mick, on the other hand, was the kind of dinosaur without all of those horns and ridges. Mick was more of a mammoth actually and mammoths never really understood the appeal of those horns and ridges. They had hair and that was it. But Mick knew how much those horns and ridges meant to Tort and while Tort knew how Mick felt them, Mick never showed his lack of amazement to Tort.

One day, Tort was out wandering without Mick. For while they did everything together, they did everything without each other. And while Tort was walking, his dinosaur body tripped over a dead duck and fell. Tort got out up and realized something was wrong. And that something was hurting. Turning his head around, he realized one of his ridges broke up. It did not hurt a lot but Tort was very sad. Now, Tort though, he looked strange. He looked strange. Tort immediately ran to find Mick cause Mick would always make him feel better.
Tort found Mick at his house as he was always here. Mick saw Tort and instantly knew that something was up. He looked up at Tort with concern.

‘Look at me Mick! What do I do?’ Tort cried. Tort kept looking at his body with frustration and sadness. Mick did not quite understand what Tort was talking about but kept silent. As Tort went on about his body, with his wise mammoth head, Mick finally understood. Mick did not see why it would matter but he was not Tort and Tort was clearly upset.

Mick, after comforting Tort and successfully getting him to calm down, sat down and racked his brain on how to get Tort’s beloved ridge to grow back. The only remedy Mick knew was how to get mammoth hair to grow back. After hours of intensive research throughout the night, Mick figured how to alter the remedy to get it to grow back dinosaur horns and ridges.

The remedy was this greenish black paste made out of many ingredients that Mick took hours to scour for. But Mick found it quite fun, like a treasure hunt. The next day, Mick ran up to Tort and applied it on Tort’s wound while explaining it to him. Tort was rather sceptical of Mick’s herbal remedy but was touched at his action as he knew that Mick really could not understand why it was a big deal.

So Mick studiously made the remedy and every morning, he tended to Tort’s wound. Mick was insistent that it would work and was excited to see it in effect. As Mick came over every morning, Tort would go on about the new remedy he had read about. Mick listened to it all, sharing Tort’s excitement but continued applying the thick greenish paste.

One day, Tort ran over excitedly to Mick’s house and Mick as usual was there. Tort was extremely excited this particular morning as there was this gifted doctor in the nearby town. This doctor specializes in breakage injuries, especially the kind Tort suffered.

‘I’m going to set off tonight! His remedy is real medicine and this time I’ll really get healed’, exclaimed Tort excitedly.

Mick looked at Tort and smiled. He went to the cupboard and reached up, grabbing 2 jars of the paste with his mammoth trunk, passing it to Tort. ‘Just continue applying this anyways. It wouldn’t hurt’, Mick said.

So Tort set out, dinosaur lumbering to the doctor. The journey took a day and a half and Tort was absolutely exhausted. And his back felt itchy, especially where his ridge broke off. But Tort did not think much about it as he was really tired. After an hour or two of reaching the town, Tort finally found the doctor and was all ready to get healed. Tort dinosaur walked to the doctor, ignoring the itch on his back.

Tort met the doctor and related the entire story to him. The doctor was not really interested in Tort as he was rather busy. The doctor was in town for a holiday and not to heal people. So he was more of a tourist than a doctor. The tourist listen half-heartedly to Tort’s story while lounging in the porch. He reached into his bag, took out a packet of brightly coloured something, tore off the label and handed it to Tort, instructing him to eat it once a day before waving him away. Tort tasted it and it tasted like gummy bears. Nevertheless, Tort was happy that he would be cured in no time.

Tort rushed back to Mick. That took 2 full days cause Tort was tired and his back was itchy all the time and Tort doesn’t dinosaur walk very fast. When Tort reached Mick, he showed Mick the packet of medicine, rambling on about how his ridge would definitely grow back by the end of this week. Mick examined with his mammoth eyes. It looked like gummy bears. Mick tasted it with his mammoth tongue. It tasted like gummy bears.

Then, Mick noticed something on Tort’s back. ‘Your ridge! It’s growing back!’ Mick pointed at Tort’s back. Tort got very excited and ran to the mirror, confirming Mick’s observation.

‘It must be the medicine! That doctor is such a genius! He did not even stop to think what medicine to give me; that’s how smart he is!’ Tort was very happy indeed. Mick smiled as he hugged Tort out of happiness, the taste of the medicine still in his mouth.

Tort left Mick’s house, a proud and happy dinosaur. Tort looked at the bag of medicine in delight, popping one into his mouth. Suddenly, he choked on this particularly long bright greenish chewy medicine.

He died.

The end.

title: [MF] Tort the Dinosaur and Mick the Mammoth

question: What does the story say about the type of ingredients that go into an herbal remedy?

answer: No answer

critique: The question is not giving ingredients of a herbal remedy, but the ingredients needed to alter their recipe to fix Tort's ridge.

critique: The ingredients aren't mentioned, but the ingredients of the mammoth hair is

critique: The answer is not stated, but it is in the story.

critique: "No answer" is incorrect as the ingredients are mentioned.

question: What does the story say about Tort?

answer: Tort is a dinosaur with many horns and ridges on his body. He is good friends with a mammoth called Mick, who is always there for him. Tort absolutely loves his horns and ridges.

critique: It is omitted that Tort's ridge broke off, causing him to be upset.

critique: Tort is not explicitly named as a carnivore, but given how he eats duck meat, this is implied.

critique: Answer omits a few details, such as the part where Tort falls on a dead duck and breaks one of his ridges.

critique: The answer should mention that Tort breaks his ridge and appears to die from eating medicine that was meant to help him.

critique: Tort's relationship with Mick is omitted.

critique: The answer should mention that Tort is killed by the medicine.

critique: The answer should mention the broken ridge.

critique: "He is good friends with a mammoth called Mick, who is always there for him." - is inaccurate because Mick doesn't always accompany Tort. He goes everywhere with Tort but that doesn't mean Mick is always there.

critique: It should be specified that Mick never helped heal Tort's ridge.

critique: It's omitted that Tort's ridge broke and Mick helped him grow it back.

critique: Key details about the last paragraph should be included in the response.

critique: It's omitted that Tort is a dinosaur who fell and broke one of his ridges.

critique: Does not mention that Tort dies after eating medicine that he thought would make his injured ridge grow back.

question: What does the story say about Mick?

answer: Mick is a mammoth. He's good friends with Tort the dinosaur. They can do everything together because Mick is pretty outgoing. They do everything together, everything. When Tort breaks a ridge, he goes to Mick for help. Mick can't fix the problem, but he does attempt to concoct some kind of treatment.

critique: More specific things about Mick can be included

critique: It's omitted that Mick gathers ingredients to try and repair Tort's ridge, but it fails and Tort dies anyway.

critique: It's omitted that Mick helps Tort after the dinosaur breaks his ridge.

critique: It's omitted that Mick is the one who helps Tort grow his ridge back.

critique: The first sentence should include the fact that Mick is not very good at fixing things.

critique: The answer should mention that Mick is the one who takes care of the problem.

critique: The answer should mention that Tort dies.

critique: The answer should mention that Mick is a good friend.

critique: The answer omits that Mick is the only one who cares about Tort's injury.

critique: The answer refers to Mick as male. It's not clear that Mick is male.

critique: The answer should mention that Mick is a good friend to Tort.

critique: The answer is mostly unrelated to the question.

critique: The response misses to mention that Mick is a good friend who is always there for Tort.

critique: "Doesn't understand why Tort is so upset about the ridge breaking." is evidence of the kind of relationship the two have. Replace "isn't very good at" with "doesn't understand" to reflect that.

text: The story never mentions that Mick is particularly outgoing.

refinement: Mick is a mammoth. He's good friends with Tort the dinosaur. They can do everything together because Mick is pretty outgoing. They do everything together, everything. When Tort breaks a ridge, he goes to Mick for help. Mick can't fix the problem, but he does attempt to concoct some kind of treatment.

question: What does the story say about the doctor Tort saw?

answer: Tort went to the doctor for treatment for his wound but the doctor was not interested. On a holiday, he didn't want to treat people who came to him instead of him going to them. The doctor was on vacation but also a doctor and specialized in breakage injuries. He only briefly listened to the wound and gave a packet of medicine. After eating one, Tort died.

critique: The doctor was not a doctor, he was a tourist.

critique: "The doctor was on vacation but also a doctor and specialized in breakage injuries. He only briefly listened to the wound and gave a packet of medicine. After eating one, Tort died." - superfluous information that doesn't really add anything to the story. Needs to be removed.

critique: It is not stated that Tort ate the medicine, but that he chewed it.

critique: Repetition. Can delete "breakage injuries" and "doctor" from the sentence about the doctor.

critique: The doctor does not specialize in breakage injuries.

critique: Words like 'on vacation' and 'rather' are not needed

critique: Grammar and spelling corrections needed.

critique: "Tort went to the doctor for treatment for his wound but the doctor was not interested." - Tort didn't go to the doctor to be treated. He was looking for a cure.

critique: The answer is not clear about the doctor's medical qualifications.

critique: Tort died from the medicine, not from the doctor's lack of interest.

critique: The answer states that the doctor was only going to see patients as they came to him but then states that he is on vacation.

text: The answer implies that the "packet of medicine" was deadly to Tort, but that's not so. Tort suffocates on a particularly long piece of gummy bear.

refinement: Tort went to the doctor for treatment for his wound but the doctor was not interested. On a holiday, he didn't want to treat people who came to him instead of him going to them. The doctor was on vacation but also a doctor and specialized in breakage injuries. He only briefly listened to the wound and gave a packet of medicine. After eating one, Tort died.


split: train

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[The Justice Department last year dropped all charges against Xiaoxing Xi, head of Temple University’s physics department; he had been accused of sharing sensitive American-made technology with China.]

Credit...Mark Makela for The New York Times

-   April 26, 2016

WASHINGTON — The Justice Department has issued new rules that give prosecutors in Washington greater oversight and control over national security cases after the collapse of several high-profile prosecutions led to allegations that Chinese-Americans were being singled out as spies.

The new rules are intended to prevent such missteps, but without undermining a counterespionage mission that is a top priority for the Obama administration.

In December 2014, the Justice Department dropped charges against two former Eli Lilly scientists, Guoqing Cao and Shuyu Li, who had been accused of leaking proprietary information to a Chinese drugmaker. Three months later, prosecutors dropped a case against Sherry Chen, a government hydrologist in Ohio who had been charged with secretly downloading information about dams.

Then in September, the Justice Department dismissed all charges against a Temple University professor, Xiaoxing Xi, after leading physicists testified that prosecutors had entirely misunderstood the science underpinning their case.

“We cannot tolerate another case of Asian-Americans being wrongfully suspected of espionage,” Representative Judy Chu, Democrat of California, said last fall. “The profiling must end.”

While those cases raised the specter of Chinese espionage, none explicitly charged the scientists as spies. The cases involved routine criminal laws such as wire fraud, so national security prosecutors in Washington did not oversee the cases.

In a letter last month to federal prosecutors nationwide, Deputy Attorney General Sally Q. Yates said that would change. All cases affecting national security, even tangentially, now require coordination and oversight in Washington. That had always been the intention of the rule, but Ms. Yates made it explicit.

“The term ‘national security issue’ is meant to be a broad one,” she wrote.

Ms. Yates told federal prosecutors that consulting with experienced national security prosecutors in Washington would help “ensure prompt, consistent and effective responses” to national security cases.

The letter, which was not made public, was provided to The New York Times by a government official.

John P. Carlin, the Justice Department’s top national security prosecutor, reorganized his staff in Washington in recent years to focus more aggressively on preventing theft of America’s trade secrets. The new rules mean that espionage experts will review cases like Dr. Xi’s. Such cases “shall be instituted and conducted under the supervision” of Mr. Carlin or other top officials, the rules say.

Peter R. Zeidenberg, a lawyer for the firm Arent Fox, who represented Dr. Xi and Ms. Chen, called the new rules “a very positive step.”

Image[Sherry Chen, a government hydrologist in Ohio, was charged with economic espionage in 2014. The case was dropped five months later.]

Credit...Maddie McGarvey for The New York Times

“It’s welcome, and it’s overdue,” he said. “A bad reaction would be ‘We’re not going to do anything. Everything is fine.’ ”

Several of the cases fell apart when defense lawyers confronted prosecutors with new evidence or previewed the arguments they planned to make in court. In traditional white-collar criminal investigations, those conversations between prosecutors and defense lawyers often happen before charges are filed. In cases involving even a whiff of espionage, however, such conversations rarely happen. Authorities worry that suspects, tipped off to the investigation, will run or destroy evidence.

The absence of those conversations makes it important, then, that such cases receive an extra layer of review, defense lawyers said.

Ms. Yates did not mention the botched cases in her letter. But at the Justice Department, they were regarded as unfortunate — and perhaps preventable — black eyes that detracted from a string of successful espionage prosecutions. The United States faces an onslaught of economic espionage and other spying from China. Last year, Chinese hackers stole a trove of government data — including Social Security numbers and fingerprints — on more than 21 million people.

Last month, Su Bin, a Chinese businessman, pleaded guilty to trying to hack into American defense contractors to steal information on the F-22 and F-35 fighter jets and Boeing’s C-17 military cargo plane. In January, a Chinese citizen pleaded guilty to trying to steal corn seeds from American companies and ship them to China to replicate their genetic properties.

In the Obama administration’s most direct confrontation with China, the Justice Department in 2014 charged five membersof the Chinese People’s Liberation Army with hacking into prominent American companies.

Mr. Zeidenberg and others have argued that rushed cases create suspicion and unfairly tarnish reputations. In the case against the Eli Lilly scientists, prosecutors were unsparing in their description.

“If the superseding indictment in this case could be wrapped up in one word, that word would be ‘traitor,’” Cynthia Ridgeway, an assistant United States attorney, told a federal court in Indiana last year, according to the Indianapolis Business Journal.

The Justice Department gave no explanation for later dropping the case, saying only that it was done “in the interests of justice.”

Prosecutors made a similar statement last year when dropping charges against Dr. Xi. The dismissal suggested investigators did not understand and did not do enough to learn the science before they brought charges. Prosecutors had accused Dr. Xi, chairman of Temple’s physics department, with sharing schematics for a piece of American-made laboratory equipment, a pocket heater, with China. After leading scientists — including the inventor of the pocket heater — testified that the schematics showed an entirely different type of heater, the Justice Department dropped the case.

Though prosecutors dropped charges against Ms. Chen, the government has said it intends to fire her. She is fighting that decision.

question: What does the story say about why the term 'national security issue' needs to be broadened?

answer: The Justice Department has issued new rules that give prosecutors in Washington greater oversight and control over national security cases. This is after high profile prosecutions led to allegations that Chinese-Americans were being singled out as spies. Deputy Attorney General Sally Q. Yates said that the term “national security issue” is meant to be a broad one.

critique: The response only mentions how the expansion of the term 'national security issue' is necessary. The answer omits the reasons. The answer should amend this.

critique: The answer should mention the specific cases.

critique: The answer should mention the specific cases that led to the new rules.

critique: The answer omits the specific cases that led to the new rules.

critique: The response misses to mention that the term “national security issue” is meant to be a broad one because the Justice Department cannot tolerate another case of Asian-Americans being wrongfully suspected of espionage. The response also fails to mention that the Justice Department dropped all charges against Xiaoxing Xi, head of Temple University’s physics department, who had been accused of sharing sensitive American-made technology with China.

critique: The answer should mention the specific cases that led to this.

critique: The response misses to mention that the term "national security issue" needs to be broadened to prevent the wrongful suspicion of Chinese-Americans as spies.

question: What does the article say about Dr. Xi's case?

answer: Dr. Xi is the head of Temple University's physics department. The Justice Department had dismissed all charges against him after leading physicists testified that prosecutors had misunderstood the science underpinning their case. Dr. Xi was accused of sharing sensitive American-made technology with China, but this was not the case.

critique: The answer omits that Dr. Xi was accused of sharing sensitive American-made technology with China.

critique: The answer should mention that the charges were dropped.

critique: The answer omits that the charges were dropped in September.

critique: "The Justice Department had dismissed all charges against him after leading physicists testified that prosecutors had misunderstood the science underpinning their case. Dr. Xi was accused of sharing sensitive American-made technology with China, but this was not the case." - this is irrelevant to the question and should be removed.

critique: The answer omits that Dr. Xi was accused of sharing schematics for a piece of American-made laboratory equipment, a pocket heater, with China.

critique: Incorrectly identifies that this is about Dr. Xi's case, however does speak about it

question: What does the article say about crime statistics?

answer: No answer

critique: The article does not provide crime statistics.

critique: The response misses to provide an answer to the task.

critique: The answer should mention that there is no mention of crime statistics in the article.

critique: The answer should mention that the article does not mention crime statistics.

critique: The response misses to provide an answer to the task in the task itself.


text:
Once upon a time, a train travelled through the snow-covered tracks of North Dakota.  Inside the train was a little too warm. Thankfully, there was a steady draft coming from some flaw in the train’s structure, and the draft was keeping Mr. McLeery’s legs cool.

Mr. McLeery had taken this train before, but never this far north. In the past, he had detrained at Lawsmith County, where he worked as a pinprick clerk for Industrial Recursions, LLD. But this morning, Mr. McLeery felt no compulsion to get off at Lawsmith. Instead, he remained on board to see just where this train goes. “It can’t go into Canada, can it?” he thought. But where is the last stop? And will any other passengers still be aboard at that point?

The train chugged along. It didn’t seem to be in a hurry. The scenery was pretty drab – white, grey and then white again. Until the brown dot. The brown dot ahead took a long time to grow into the shape of a building. Mr. McLeery attributed this to the otherwise vacant landscape, allowing him to see for miles across the snowy plains.

But there it was, a building. And soon enough, the train’s breaks slowly screeched, and a slightly mechanized voice announced the “last stop, Downey’s Creek.” Mr. McLeery looked about the train car. There were no other passengers, and no train personnel. And so, he gathered up his briefcase and his down jacket, and Mr. McLeery detrained.

The first, obvious sign of incongruity was the lack of a creek at Downey’s Creek. The second sign was the complete absence of life, other than his own, as the train pulled out of the station. The doors of the old, wooden, brown train station were unlocked, but no one was inside. There were no roads that Mr. McLeery could see that approached the station.

The train took a few minutes to maneuver around the tracks and to retreat southward. Then, Mr. McLeery was alone.

“Perhaps this was a mistake,” thought Mr. McLeery. But he was keenly aware of the fact that he didn’t much feel concerned about his precarious situation. How long until another train arrived? Where would he get food? Would he have to spend the night? And where? Plus, he was fairly certain that his cell phone would not work out here. After all, it barely worked back in Lawsmith. But none of this worried Mr. McLeery, as he stepped off the platform and began trudging in a random direction, through the snow.

The snow was about a foot deep, and made loud, crunchy noises as he stepped. They were the only noises, other than his own breathing, that Mr. McLeery could hear. After 20 minutes of walking, Mr. McLeery looked back. The brown station was small. After another 20 minutes, he looked back again. Now the station was just a brown dot. In another 20 minutes, his right ankle becoming a little sore, Mr. McLeery looked back again, and this time saw nothing but snow. He stopped to enjoy the sensation of being in the center of a sea of snow – no trees, no houses, no people, no animals. Not even any birds. Just Mr. McLeery, holding his briefcase, surrounded by an empty, white plain.

Uncertain which direction to continue, Mr. McLeery remained still, waiting for something to happen. As the afternoon turned to evening, the temperature dropped, and Mr. McLeery closed his eyes to the burning cold. He began to freeze. Sitting down was no longer an option, as his legs would refuse to bend. As Mr. McLeery died, his focus turned deeply inward.  He was completely unaware of the snow and the cold and even of his dying body. Mr. McLeery’s attention was consumed by an image. An image of great meaning. And he was becoming part of that meaning, and had always been a part.

Mr. McLeery’s body was a frozen shell – a man, standing in a snowy, white pain, holding a briefcase. To an observer, he would have appeared like a wildly out of place statue commemorating normalcy; the normal as abnormal. But there was no observer, and there was no Mr. McLeery.

[For more stories & wordplay, visit me at www.daisybrain.com]

title: Mr. McLeery

question: What happens to Mr. McLeery at the end of the story?

answer: He freezes to death.

critique: The answer should mention that he is unaware of his dying body.

text: The answer is too short and vague. It should offer a brief summary of the events after Mr. McLeery detrains at Downey's Creek.

category: coverage

question: Where does Mr. McLeery think the train might stop?

answer: He thinks the train might stop in Canada.

critique: He thinks the train might stop in Canada, but he doesn't know for sure.

critique: The answer should be in a full sentence.

critique: It is not stated that he thinks the train might stop in Canada.

text: He's curious about where it will stop and thinks that it wouldn't be Canada.

category: accuracy


text:
Damn. Now I really didn't see this happening. Of all the things to happen at this bland school and this is the shit that happens. Wow. I guess I'm getting a bit carried, let me start from the beginning.
          My school, Jefferson Middle School, is rather boring, nothing really exciting happens here except the occasional girl drama that usally goes like, "Brian likes me! Not you, skany hoe!" And ends in a matter of three days. I'm usually quiet, if you were to call me "popular girl," you would be wrong but calling me a "nerd" wouldn't be right either. I was just sort of there. I had my friends and that's all I needed. That's where this story starts. With my friend, Daniel. Daniel was a pretty intresting boy. All acceralted classes, loved video games and comics, and wasn't bad looking at all. Over the first year of middle school, Daniel and I became pretty close. Hanging out after school and learning about eachother. It was pretty nice. Daniel loved life and he wasn't afraid to show it. If he had something to say, oh would he say it, but he was never disrespectful about it. He was always being a gentlemen. People always said shit about him.
         "Oh! Did you hear about Daniel? I heard he was sucking cock in the bathroom!"
         "Daniel the fag!"
         "Daniel should go burn in fucking hell with all the other fags that enjoy buttsex!" Get the trend here? They kept on saying he was gay, over and over. Through messages on Facebook, notes, or even writing on bathroom walls, which is very cliche. There have been times where I have asked if he was gay and I would get the same answer every time.
          "Do you think I am?" Over and over, he never changed it. Daniel was really proud and he felt as if he shouldn't state if he were gay or not and I really admire that about him. 8th grade started and I assumed that the gay jokes would have gotten old by now, but they didn't. They actual got worse. More people started calling him a "fag, dick-sucker," and spreading rumors that I don't even wanna remember. I noticed a change in Daniel, he wasn't as outgoing, didn't speak his mind, became less quite, less proud. I tried helping him, I really did but it never worked. He seemed to just become more depressed. Those kids never noticed either, they just attacked him more and more, getting more ruthless with each insult. This drama was lasting way more than three days and I wasn't sure what would happen. Shit even got worsed.
          That's when I heard the intercom come on one day during class.
       "Students, I am sad to announce that our student, Daniel Rigsbee, has died yesterday." They didn't tell us how he died, but we all knew. He killed himself. The voice of the principal announcing his death was so fucking emotionless, it made it seem as if Daniel was some character in a movie that died. Everyone was silent. I was filled with anger. Those ruthless bastards did this. They didn't know when to stop. The minute the bell rang, I sprinted to his house asking if it was true was they said today. His father simply nodded and beckoned me in. He said that there was a note left in his room directed to me and "bitches." I walked to his room, feeling as if I was going to puke. I found the note, all directed in rainbows, colors, and smiley faces. It made me sick. I opened the note with nervoness and read.
        "Dear Juno and the son of bitches at school. Let me make this clear. I am not fucking gay. I am as straight as the pole your mom dances on. I should not have to tell people this, it's my life and you shouldn't be butting in. Pun intended. You caused this and I hope you feel great. You did it! You've killed me! I'm not gonna say that this wasn't your guys' fault because fuck that. It totally was. I hope you live with that burden that you killed me for your whole life. Juno, I hope you live a great life and don't cry over me, you didn't cause this. You are amazing and don't let people do what they did to me to you. I would punch their neck. (:
                                            Bye,
                                                  Daniel-Not fucking gay-Rigsbee
        What the fuck? That wasn't sad at all. This was the Daniel that I knew. He killed himself because he was done of the shit. I don't think he felt sorry or anything. I don't even know. As I turned to leave, I found something else. It was another note reading, "I hope this was exciting enough for you, Juno. I am a coward. I wasn't gonna deal with this anymore. They didn't win, remerber that. I won. They get to deal with my death. -Daniel"
         Fucking. Daniel.

title: Uhhmm...Well I'm 13 and I would like to be a writer when I get older so here's one of my short stories. Reviews? Be honest.

question: What does the story say about bullying?

answer: The author believes bullies didn't care about Daniel and that their bullying tactics might have made Daniel commit suicide. She believes the bullies are the ones who killed her friend. She points out that the bullies were unrelenting, and the only resolution he could find was to kill himself.

critique: The first sentence is a bit confusing. It would be better to say that the author believes bullies didn't care about Daniel and that their bullying tactics might have made him commit suicide.

text: The story is quite clear that Daniel committed suicide because of the bullying.

question: Summarize the narrator's relationship with Daniel.

answer: Juno and Daniel are best friends and have been since 8th grade. She cares deeply for him. However, she didn't notice the student body's cruelty towards him. She was angry when she heard he committed suicide.

critique: The answer should mention that Daniel is the one who committed suicide.

critique: The narrator's anger at Daniel's death is omitted.

text: Not only did the narrator notice the bullying, but she also tried to help Daniel.

question: Summarize the school's reaction to Daniel's death.

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the school's reaction was emotionless.

question: What does the story say about the bullies' reaction to Daniel's note?

answer: No answer

critique: The response can include the actual content of the note because it's declared to be public in the story.

critique: The response is incorrect. The story does not say anything about the bullies' reaction to Daniel's note.

critique: The response is not related to the passage.

critique: The answer should mention that the bullies did not react to the note.

critique: The answer should mention that the bullies didn't have a reaction.


text:
PETTAI (புதுபேட்டை) is an industrial suburban area in Tirunelveli City. It is approximately 60 kilometers of downtown Tirunelveli along the Southern Railway line to Tenkasi.[1] It is been administered by the Tirunelveli City Municipal Corporation.

History

Pettai actually got its name from the Vandi Pettais (godowns with cart-parking facilities). These Vandi Pettais were dealing with few agriculture commodities such as coriander, and chilli. Pettai is a populous urban area with many small-scale industries.

Glorious Time

Similar to many towns, Pettai also had a glorious time when the Co-operative Spinning Mill was in operation. People from across Tamil Nadu flocked here for the employment in this mill. Most of them settled here.

Industrial Estate

Pettai Industrial Estate is operated by SIDCO.[2] The major products manufactured here are PVC pipes, tanks, cooking utensils, nails, mattresses, etc. TANSI is also operated inside this estate. Government ITI and MSME are also present.

Educational Institutions

Though Pettai is situated near the Oxford of South India (Palayamkottai), it also has established educational institutions.

-   Government ITI[3]
-   Kamarajar Higher Secondary School
-   MDT Hindu College[4]
-   Rani Anna Girls' School
-   St. Antony's High School

Apart from this, there are number of private schools serving for the Pettai Public.

Religious Places

Though Pettai can be termed as a diverse population. Thevars form the majority.

Following are the notable temples in Pettai

-   Sivan Kovil near the police station
-   Murugan Kovil in Pandiyapuram
-   Vinai Theertha Vinayagar Kovil
-   Sundara Vinayagar Kovil
-   Narayanaswamy Kovil
-   Santhana Mariamman Kovil
-   Durgai Amman Kovil
-   Thiripura Sundari Amman Kovil
-   Uchinimakaali Amman Kovil

Following are the mosques in Pettai

-   Mohammed Nainar (M.N.P) Pallivasal
-   Rahumania Pallivasal (R.P)
-   M.G.P Pallivasal

Below are the notable Churches

-   St. Antony's Church
-   CSI Christ Church
-   St. Madha Church
-   Philadelphia Good News Mission Church, Veerabaghu Nagar, Pettai.

Famous

Pettai is famous for evening snacks such as Vadai and Murukku. They are famous because they are fried in the oils produced at traditional oil mills here. Chekkadi had many chekku (traditional oil mills). It is also famous for Parotta stalls. Earlier only Pettai hotels served parottas during lunch along with rice.

Famous Person

Quide Millath. On his remembrance, the government hospital in has been renamed. The Cheranmahadevi road flows within Pettai is also named after him as Quaid e Millath Road.

Shopping Hub

Pettai Bazaar serves as a shopping hub for the nearby villages.

Entertainment

Pettai had a movie theatre, Meenakshi Theatre.

Demographics

At the 2001 census, Pettai had 1,060 inhabitants, with 534 males and 526 females.[5][6]

Notes

Category:Cities and towns in Tirunelveli district

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[6] 2001 Census Village Code = 1603800,

title: Pettai, Tirunelveli

question: Why is education important in Pettai?

answer: Though Pettai is situated near the Oxford of South India, it also has established educational institutions. It has many government ITIs and MSMEs. It has a wide range of institutions, from private to public schools. It even has famous church institutions. Lastly, it has famous personal scholars.

critique: "It has a wide range of institutions, from private to public schools. It even has famous church institutions. Lastly, it has famous personal scholars." - this is not mentioned in the article

critique: The last two sentences are irrelevant to the question.

critique: The answer is not relevant to the question.

critique: It is omitted that churches in Pettai are also considered educational institutions.

critique: The answer does not answer the question.

critique: Answer is irrelevant as the question is not answered.

critique: This is not relevant to the question and should be omitted.

critique: The Oxford of South India isn't a university-type school.

critique: The last sentence is redundant since it would imply that one is a scholar to be famous.

critique: The answer is not about education, but about Pettai's schools.

critique: The answer is too long and does not answer the question.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: Due to the high population density of Pettai, the underserved population must use private institutions or have to travel to Tirunelveli. Schools should be considered a public good.

text: The article does not answer this question. Thus, the answer is inaccurate.

refinement: Though Pettai is situated near the Oxford of South India, it also has established educational institutions. It has many government ITIs and MSMEs. It has a wide range of institutions, from private to public schools. It even has famous church institutions. Lastly, it has famous personal scholars.

question: What religious groups exist in Pettai?

answer: Mostly Hindu, but with some Muslim and Christian populations.

critique: The answer should mention the specific temples and mosques.

critique: The response misses to mention the population proportion of each religious group.

critique: The answer should include the names of the Hindu temples and mosques.

critique: The demographic is a town with a diverse population from rural Tamil Nadu, not just Pettai.

critique: There are more than just three religious groups in Pettai.

critique: "Religious Places" covers the religious places for all religions. I suggest making a separate note about the various temples and mosques.

critique: There are more than two religious groups mentioned.

critique: "Mostly Hindu, but with some Muslim and Christian populations" is not comprehensive for the number of religious groups. Update with the complete list and please include the total population as per the 2001 census.

critique: "Mostly Hindu, but with some Muslim and Christian populations" - there are a lot more than just these religious groups.

critique: The answer should not be written in the form of a question.

critique: The answer should include the religious places where people can practice their religions.

text: The article does not explicitly answer this question, making the answer unattested.

refinement: Mostly Hindu, but with some Muslim and Christian populations.

question: What foods are famous in Pettai and why?

answer: The breads Vadai and Murukku are said to be reason of fame in Pettai presumably due to its connection with the oil mill trade in the area.

critique: The answer could use more details about the oil mills.

critique: The "oil mill trade" is not mentioned in the passage.

critique: The food is connected to the mill, but the oil is not mentioned in the article.

critique: "The breads Vadai and Murukku are said to be reason of fame in Pettai presumably due to its connection with the oil mill trade in the area." - is incorrect. The answer should mention that the foods are famous because they are fried in the oils produced at traditional oil mills in the area.

critique: It is not implied that oil mill trade is the reason for the foods' fame. The oil mills produce oils from which the foods are fried.

critique: The statement about the oil mills is unattested.

critique: The answer should mention the oil mills.

critique: The response is a bit misleading. It is not clear that the oil mill trade is the reason.

critique: The final sentence is not a reason for the food's fame.

critique: Vadai means "venni" or donuts, but the article never indicates that it's famous for vadai. It just indicates that it's famous for buns or "Parotta"

critique: The answer leaves the reader to themselves "presumably" to assumedly conclude as to why the foods are famous.

text: The answer fails to mention parotta.

refinement: The breads Vadai and Murukku are said to be reason of fame in Pettai presumably due to its connection with the oil mill trade in the area.


text:
„Purge it!“ Ramsey looked down to the screen. His fingertips hovered above a small rectangle which would unleash hell. Again, the sharp voice cut through the mayhem on the bridge. „Commander, I need your acknowledgement. Purge it!" Since the spaceship was already shaking from missile hit after missile hit, nobody noticed his trembling hand.
His gaze wandered a little higher to the massive observation window. The curvature could clearly be seen, seperating ground and heaven. Ramsey remembered being down there once, sitting in a space port with some friends from the academy and listening to an interesting history talk.

He had purged a moon six months before. There were riots on the small colony Triton-4, and Benson had ordered the same command. It was just a small colony. But together with the eight other colonies on the moon they were building a new jumpgate in Neptun's orbit. The first one was fully operational and orbiting Uranus, about 12 billion spacemen had already traveled to their new homes a few dozen lightyears away. It was a slow process, and an expensive one. Luckily the people on the surfaces volunteered for the hard work – at least all the officers told so.

But now he was in doubt. A big fleet of construction ships was hovering near the sun, ready to install the solar panels for the giant Dyson sphere. Ramsey hadn't fully grasped the concept, but it was something like a bubble around the sun. It would still let some light pass through, but could harness the energy and solve all their energy problems.
Somehow, the people down their didn't like that and broke the 70 year long peace by blowing two of the construction ships up. Things escalated quickly and a week later the Omega's weapon systems were programmed to destroy 500 million km², ready to tansform the surface into a billowing, red-glowing mass.

Their spaceship was built for only one thing: Annihilating surfaces. With a length of 327 meters it carried an arsenal of the most devastating weapons ever created, and after its deployment the third world war came to a grinding halt. That was 90 years ago, and while much bigger ships were built, all of them combined still couldn't match the unique firepower of the Omega.
It was a tool of peace and stability, his captain said. Ramsey remembered watching the surface of Triton evaporate under their glowing beams and heavy bombardement, but he didn't feel peaceful at all.

"Shield system critical", the computer voice rattled. They could sustain the attack for another minute, maybe two. Unless he touched the small rectangle. But he couldn't do it. "Captain, this is insane. We can't decide the fate of 9 billion people." - "We can, and we must. As they shot our unarmed construction ships down, they knew what they did. And you know what to to, acknowledge my order and purge those surfacemen!" Captain Benson clenched her fist. "Commander, now!"
Surely she was right. Her orders came directly from the artificial intelligence, and it had never been wrong. If he touched the rectangle, he would be the hero of the day and the war was over. But if he didn't, the missiles from the surface would break their shield in a few seconds and then their armored hull in a few more. There was no more time to think. His finger jerked down.

In a millisecond, the computer scanned his DNA and initalized the launch process. "Authentication phrase", chattered the computer voice. Ramsey stared through the observation window at the soft glow of the atmosphere.   The authentication phrase glared in his thoughts like the sun. He chose it a long time ago, as he visited the planet. It was after a history talk – maybe an hour long and illustrated with lots of pictures. Beautiful pictures from the ancient times. Their history. Slowly, he uttered the authentication phrase. "Earth ... is ... beautiful."

title: I don't like happy ends [~650 words]

question: Summarize the source of tension in the story.

answer: On a planet, a war broke out. The planet's people shot a fleet of construction ships down, which is when the Omega's weapon system was programmed to destroy 500 million km². These missiles could be the last of planet's people. The commander is uncertain if he wants to be the one that ends all life on the planet, but he knows his ship can't sustain the attack for much longer.

critique: "the last of planet's people" is inaccurate. It's the last of the 9 billion people on the planet.

critique: The planet is not described as being on fire, the missiles are not the last of the planet's people, and the commander is not uncertain about ending all life on the planet.

critique: Including the commander's name would make this response better.

critique: The answer should mention that the planet is Earth.

text: The response is incoherent and makes little sense. It should mention the source of tension in the story - Ramseys people vs the surfacemen who didn't like the giant Dyson sphere around the sun.

question: Summarize the theme of this story.

answer: The theme of this story is that you cannot make a decision for millions of people. Sometimes, the choices you make for others may have unforeseen consequences.

critique: It's the commander's choice to make the decision, not for him to take. "Whisked out of our hair" is probably better wording for "away with".

critique: The answer should mention the consequences of the decision Ramsey makes.

critique: "The theme of this story is that you cannot make a decision for millions of people. Sometimes, the choices you make for others may have unforeseen consequences." - this is incorrect. The theme of the story is about the commander's decision to purge the surface of the planet.

critique: The theme is about the consequences of war.

critique: The theme of the story is the struggle between following orders and doing what you believe is right.

critique: "The theme of this story is that you cannot make a decision for millions of people." - the theme of the story is about the commander's decision to purge the planet based on orders from the captain. Rewrite the answer.

critique: The theme is not that you cannot make a decision for millions of people.

question: Explain the meaning behind the authentication phrase.

answer: No answer

critique: The response doesn't give an answer to the question. It should.

critique: The answer can be found in the passage so it should be included.

text: The response can't be blank. The meaning of the authentication phrase was clearly stated in the text. Ramsey visited the Earth a long time ago for a history talk and he loves the beautiful pictures from ancient times.


text:
I've never really written anything before, so sorry if it's terrible. Critique is always welcome!

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   It was two in the afternoon when Jack decided to go for a walk. The house was empty, as usual, and loneliness always made him want to be outside. Grabbing his copy of Animal Farm, he threw on a thin sweatshirt and closed the door softly behind him, as if trying to tell his house of his somber mood. Standing just outside his door, he paused only to sigh, and then set forth toward the park.

   The walk was uneventful, but the park was quite the opposite: children chasing squirrels, couples walking dogs and students holding hands filled the cobblestone walkways while a stranger strumming the guitar laid on the grass, humming to himself in self-enjoyment.

   Jack found an empty bench on the far side of the park; he always found that this area was far more enjoyable. There was less noise, less traffic, and the leaves on the trees were always arranged in such a way that they left little patches of light flickering across the ground. It was late August, the weather was beginning to cool, and the crisp autumn air was creeping up on the humidity of summer.

   On the bench, Jack made himself comfortable. He leaned back, draped the ankle of his right foot over the knee of his left, and opened the book. In Jack’s opinion, reading was an activity that was best enjoyed outside in public places. It let him dive deeper into his thoughts, and though he was surrounded by many people, it left that lingering feeling of loneliness. It was a feeling that Jack was so accustomed to that he had convinced himself that he truly enjoyed it.

   Jack was only a quarter of the way down his third page when he first saw the glimmer of light-orange out of the corner of his eye. He didn’t look up, but he could tell that a person was approaching him, a girl. Confidence was in her steps, and when she neared the bench, she stopped.

   “Mind if I sit here?”

   Jack looked up. Her golden hair was the first thing he noticed, followed quickly by her bright orange dress that swayed gently with the wind. Her sudden vibrant appearance caught him so off guard that he almost forgot to reply.

   “Oh, of course!” He slid over to the left, making room for her.

   The girl smiled, a genuine, kind smile, and sat down gracefully. She put her bag down beside her and pulled out a book of her own. Within minutes, the two were completely absorbed in their reading. Any stranger that walked by could have rightfully assumed that they were blissfully unaware of the other.

   Except that Jack wasn’t. He was painfully aware of the girl’s presence, even more so when she pulled out an old copy of 1984. More than once, he debated turning to her and innocently exclaiming, “Orwell!”

   She would look at him with confusion. “Sorry?”

   “George Orwell,” he would say again, motioning toward her novel.

   “Oh, yeah.” She would smile and look at the cover, as if noticing it for the first time.

   “It’s a good one.”

   “Oh it’s my favorite!” She would exclaim. The two would look into each other’s eyes, smile shyly and feel an instant connection.

   Then she would introduce herself, and Jack would shake her hand and introduce himself. And with that small conversation, a friendship would sprout, and from a friendship, perhaps something more.

   However, Jack said none of those things. He sat in silence, pretending to read his book while imagining what fun the two could have if he would just speak to her. But the more he imagined, the more scenarios popped up into his head.

   Perhaps she wasn’t like how he imagined. Perhaps she would hate him, think he was annoying if he tried to talk to her while she was reading.

   He would exclaim, “Orwell!”

   “Sorry?”

   “George Orwell, 1984.”

   The girl would raise her eyebrows in mild annoyance, but remain polite. “Yup!”

   “It’s a good one.”

   Finally, she would sigh and look at him. “Excuse me, but I’m just trying to read.” She’d put her book back up, shielding out Jack, and he’d be left slightly embarrassed, wishing he had never said anything.

   And so, Jack did exactly that: he never said anything. He went back to reading his book and left the girl in the orange dress alone.

   After a long while, when Jack was on page 40 or so, the girl’s cellphone rang. She picked it out of her pocket and read a text, laughing quietly to herself. She tapped out a quick reply, put her phone back and picked up her bag. As she stood up to leave, Jack looked up one last time, pretending that he had just remembered her existence. The girl looked back at him as well, and smiled. Not a big a smile, nor a significant smile, but a smile.

   And with that, she walked away, and in a few minutes, she was out of sight. Jack sighed. He wondered how he always got so attached to these people he met on the street, characters in a story whose names were not even revealed. It tugged at something deep in his heart, and loneliness filled his thoughts for a split moment; but after that moment, it was all gone.

   He convinced himself that people were not as interesting as he made them out to be, that each person's life story was not something he should bother to learn. Not realizing that another opportunity had just passed him by.

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Thanks for reading and alla that

title: [Romance-ish] Missed Chances (876 Words)

question: Summarize Jack's primary source of conflict.

answer: Jack's conflict in the story is his constant struggle with loneliness and unrequited love. His desire to seek human connection stops him from collecting his thoughts in his mind and expressing them to others. This can be seen as he internalizes the conversation with the woman in her orange dress, yet he never says a word to her. This, along with the idea that he shouldn't be speaking to strangers, keeps him in a low state in which he commits himself to a quicker pace of lonesomeness.

critique: The answer is not about Jack and his love interest in the park, but is about his love interest in life in general.

critique: The response contains inaccurate information.

critique: "His desire to seek human connection stops him from collecting his thoughts in his mind and expressing them to others." - Jack's desire to seek human connection does not stop him from collecting his thoughts in his mind and expressing them to others. He feels that way because he is lonely. This does not make sense.

critique: The last sentence is very confusing to read.

critique: "This can be seen as he internalizes the conversation with the woman in her orange dress," is inaccurate. What Jack does is a fantasy of what he would do if he knew who the woman was. He never says a word to her.

critique:
- The narrator should be mentioned here.
- I think this last sentence perhaps doesn't reflect the entire picture? What if the girl shows interest?

critique: "This, along with the idea that he shouldn't be speaking to strangers, keeps him in a low state in which he commits himself to a quicker pace of lonesomeness." - this does not make sense.

critique: The first sentence is not relevant to the question.

critique: The passage doesn't contain the information to infer or imply anything about Jack's "constant struggle with loneliness and unrequited love," let alone the second one.

question: Explain how Jack could avoid this conflict.

answer: Jack knows that being silent prevents more conflict, and that next time he is in a similar circumstance, he will find the backbone to communicate. He also desires not to force a friendship and most likely romance to form between him and this stranger who is catching on board with him seamlessly, but he knows it could work by connecting on page and stream.

critique: There is no evidence that Jack knows remaining silent prevents more conflict.

critique: The response is not related to the question.

critique: This is not a conflict, and there is no conflict.

critique: "who is catching on board with him seamlessly" is not quite grammatical

critique: There is a grammatical error in the response.

critique: There is no mention of the star not "catching on" with Jack.

critique: There is no record of the girl catching on board with him seamlessly

critique: The answer is not relevant or accurately related to the question.

text: Should mention that simply interacting with people instead of internalizing the possibilities and no action would solve the conflict.

refinement: Jack knows that being silent prevents more conflict, and that next time he is in a similar circumstance, he will find the backbone to communicate. He also desires not to force a friendship and most likely romance to form between him and this stranger who is catching on board with him seamlessly, but he knows it could work by connecting on page and stream.

question: Summarize the reasons why Jack lacks confidence when it comes to striking up conversations with young women.

answer: It is unclear if he's recently gone through a breakup, or if his relationships prior to that were not fulfilling. Whatever the reason, Jack seems very nervous about meeting new people and making outward displays of attraction toward them. He always pictures the worst possible scenarios playing out in his mind before acting on any of his impulses, imagining the rejection and disapproval he would face by approaching women.

critique: The answer is not clear about the reason for Jack's lack of confidence.

critique: The response fails to summarize the reasons why Jack lacks confidence when it comes to striking up conversations with young women.

critique: The response is not related to the question.

critique: "It is unclear if he's recently gone through a breakup, or if his relationships prior to that were not fulfilling. Whatever the reason, Jack seems very nervous about meeting new people and making outward displays of attraction toward them. He always pictures the worst possible scenarios playing out in his mind before acting on any of his impulses, imagining the rejection and disapproval he would face by approaching women." - this is wrong because the passage does not say anything about Jack's past relationships. This should be omitted.

critique: "Breakup, or if his relationships prior to that were not fulfilling." - it's not clear if he has recently gone through a breakup or if his relationships were not fulfilling. Replace this with the fact that Jack is always nervous about meeting new people and making outward displays of attraction toward them.

critique: The answer states Jack is nervous about making outward displays of attraction towards women. This is not a reason.

critique: "It is unclear if he's recently gone through a breakup, or if his relationships prior to that were not fulfilling." - this is incorrect. Jack is not in a relationship.

critique: Points 2 and 3 are wrong. Point 1 is the state of uncertainty that Jack is dealing with, because the reader does not know whether his most recent relationship was influential in Jack meeting the orange-clad girl. Point 2 and 3 make it sound as if Jack had a series of failed relationships with women prior to meeting the orange-clad girl. Point 2 is hinged on an inference from the text that an ex is part of the reason Jack left the orange-clad girl unattended to the texting. Point 3 could be the pessimist in Jack talking, but is probably not related.

critique: Jack is not nervous about meeting new people; he is nervous about meeting women

critique:
-He hasn't gone through a breakup, his relationships have just never seemed to work out.
-It seems he's had a lot of negative past experiences when it comes to relationships.

critique: This response is irrelevant to the question and inaccurate.

critique: It is not mentioned that Jack recently went through a breakup.

question: What does this story have to say about taking chances?

answer: The story asks that sometimes you have to take those sideways and unexpected paths; however, the narrator chooses caution in the female. It is likely she is not really what he thought, she was a perfect stranger, and if he took a chance on a relationship there could have been consequences.

critique: It is mentioned that the narrator is an unreliable narrator.

critique: "The story asks that sometimes you have to take those sideways and unexpected paths; however, the narrator chooses caution in the female." - this part is irrelevant and should be deleted.

critique: The answer is a bit off and doesn't answer the question.

critique: The story does not say that the narrator chooses caution in the female.

critique: It is not clear that the narrator is a male.

critique: It's omitted that the narrator never takes the chance to say hello to the girl.

critique: The story does not say that the girl is not what he thought. She is his ideal.

critique: The story doesn't say that the girl is a perfect stranger.

critique: The narrator never thought about the female.

critique: The narrator is not cautious-he is too scared to strike up a conversation.


text:
The sixth floor of the library was a graveyard. That is not to say that it was lifeless. It was just the place where students tried to save their already dead academic careers. The occupants were so buried by the books on the desks of their cubicles that they seemed to hardly twitch, blink, or even breathe. My own breath was a veritable death rattle. Dead eyes scanned lines in thick textbook at breakneck speed, flicking left to right, left to right, over and over. Not even the graffiti screaming “Alpha Nu sucks ass”, or the endless rebuttals could pull their eyes from the page. I was wearing headphones without any music playing, just to keep out the clicking of keyboards and the scratch of pages turning. It was 2 a.m., and smack in the middle of finals week. My eyes burned as if I had I had thrown salt into them, and were watering so badly that I couldn’t read the formulas on the page without first wiping them dry. I had said at the beginning of the semester that calculus would be the death of me, and the balcony was calling my name.

My phone buzzed at 2:17, and I didn’t hear it. It wasn’t until 2:23, when I slammed my pencil down in disgust at getting another problem wrong, and the tears really started to flow, that I picked up and unlocked my phone that I read the text from Anna. “Ugh, fuck calc, am I right?”, she had typed. I typed back, “Yeah, Im probably gonna have to pull an all nighter”. She responded quickly, “yeah me too. if you wanna come over and help me that’d be great :)”. Now, I knew that Anna was a nice enough girl, but she was notoriously promiscuous (I’d like to give myself credit for that, she used to be a shy girl), and I was fairly sure that she had only gotten to the point that she had only survived that far into the semester by sleeping with the professor. I was fairly sure that I would end up briefly inserting various parts of my body into various holes in her body, followed by sleeping through the exam. As appealing as that sounded, I knew that I had to pass this test, and I knew that in order to do that I had to stay up all night preparing for it. So I texted her back “maybe later” and silenced my phone.

I jerked awake at 5:31, splashing myself with the puddle of drool that had accumulated on page 347 of my textbook. I began to swear violently, getting out three quarters of a word before I remembered my surroundings. I took a second to gather myself, and then delved doggedly back into calculus. Another ninety minutes of eye-burning frustration and twenty textbook pages passed before I let myself check my phone. Surprisingly, I had a missed call and a voicemail from Anna. As I was still in the library, I resolved to listen to it later. Another half hour of studying passed before I gave up and headed back to my dorm for a nap before my test. I was so worn out that the voicemail slipped my mind.

My alarm blared at eight. I was shower, dressed, groomed, and eating cheerios in the cafeteria by 8:40. I brought my textbook and did some last minute cramming with the final twenty minutes before my exam. With my heart racing to about 130 beats per minute, I walked from the cafeteria to my exam room, sat in my preferred seat, and spent the next two hours dominating a calculus exam. My confidence grew as I found each problem easier and easier. By the last page of the test I was almost laughing. My studying appeared to have paid off, and I waited outside the exam room to brag to Anna. She didn’t show up, which I found odd. There was no way she could have finished before me. Then I remembered her voicemail, and I fished my phone out of pocket to listen to it.

Campus security had to break her door down. They didn’t let me see the body, but I saw some of the pills on the ground after they had finished. Xanax. Powder blue pills pockmarked the linoleum.  Based on her voicemail, I don’t think she was taking them to relax.

My parents had to come get me four days later. I hadn’t left my room or my bed in that time, alternating between sleeping and waking up sobbing from the horrible nightmares I was having. The doctors would later diagnose it as some variant of Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder, but I knew better than that. It was guilt. I could have saved Anna from calculus if I hadn’t cared so much about myself. That haunts me to this day.

title: [RF] Anna and I: A Calculus Story

question: Summarize the setting of this story.

answer: The setting of the story is on the sixth floor of the library, smack in the middle of finals week. The narrator is studying calculus and has decided that calculus is going to be the death of him.

text: The setting of the story is more than just the time of day and location, it should also include the situation. The narrator is a student who has to make a choice between spending the night studying for the exam, or spending the night with Anna.

question: Summarize why Anna had been calling the narrator.

answer: Anna probably wanted some help with her studies. She had texted the narrator that she wanted him to come over and help her with her homework, but the narrator refused since he was busy studying for his exams. However, Anna had texted once again, alerting him that she pleased with him earlier and was looking forward to his help. Naturally, the narrator didn't pay Anna's texts any mind since he was busy cramming for his exams.

critique: The narrator was not busy studying for his exams. He was busy studying for his calculus exam.

critique: The narrator did not refuse to help Anna. He just said he would help her later.

critique: The answer is totally made up. It also doesn't mention the suicide.

question: Summarize the type of mental health support the campus offered their students and employees.

answer: No answer

critique: The text does mention Xanax, which is a medication for anxiety, so it can be inferred that the campus may offer mental health support.

critique: The text mentions that the campus security broke down Anna's door. This is evidence that the campus offers some sort of mental health support.

critique: The story mentions that the campus security broke down Anna's door, which implies that they were the ones who found her.

critique: The answer should mention the fact that there was no mental health support.

critique: The answer should mention that the campus security broke down Anna's door.

critique: The text mentions that the campus security broke down Anna's door, which implies that they were the ones who were supposed to offer support.

critique: The story does not mention anything about mental health support on campus.

critique: Because the story does not mention this detail about the campus, the answer should reflect this.


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question: Why are there different styles of hearing aids instead of just one style for everyone?

answer: The different styles are meant to accommodate different needs.

critique: The answer is too vague. It should be more specific about the needs that the different styles accommodate.

critique: The question does not ask what the different styles are for, but why there are different styles in the first place.

critique: The question is not asking why there are different styles, but why they are different.

critique: The answer is not fully accurate. The different styles are meant to accommodate different needs, but there are also different needs for different people.

critique: The answer is self-explanatory, but lacks necessary details.

text: The passage does not answer the question.


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RADIO ART is the use of radio for art.

An artist who works in radio art is not necessarily a trained DJ, programmer, producer, or engineer, but one who uses sound to make art. The radio medium can be used in ways which are different from what it was intended for.[1] In that sense, the way the message is transmitted and received by an audience is as important as the message itself. “As an aural art form it reaffirms that it's not just what we say, but the way we say it.” [2] In Victoria Fenner's words, “Radio art is art which is specifically composed for the medium of radio and is uniquely suited to be transmitted via the airwaves.” [3]

Artists use radio technology (i.e. radio transmission, airwaves...) to communicate artistic compositions for interpretation – exposing their audience to alternate means to experiencing their art through sound verses visualization. Radio Art contributes to new media art - a digitally driven art movement growing in response to the informative technological revolution we live in. “From the artist's point of view radio is an environment to be entered into and acted upon, a site for various cultural voices to meet, converse, and merge in. These artists cross disciplines, raid all genres and recontextualize them into hybrids.” [4]

Radio art projects can be collaborative including various professional sources, unifying an audio broadcast with science, experimentation, geography, entertainment, etc." Some have approached radio as an architectural space to be constructed sonically and linguistically; or as the site of an event, an arena, or stage. Some used it as a gathering place, or a conduit, a means to create community. Other artists have employed the media landscape itself as the narrative, while others looked into the body as the site and the source; the voicebox, the larynx become medium and metaphor." [5]

Styles

Styles include radio documentary, radio drama, soundscape, sound art, electroacoustic music, sound poetry, performance, open source, translation, interviews, audio galleries, soundscape, sound art, electroacoustic music, sound poetry intended for the radio, spoken word, concerts, experimental narratives, sonic geographies, pseudo documentaries, radio cinema, conceptual and multimedia performances intended for the radio.

Art radio and webradio

An art radio is a radio station that would dedicate every second of its transmission time to radio art. Although this kind of project can seem utopian in the traditional state of radio, there are few lasting experiences in the underground or community side such as London's ResonanceFM, and Upstate New York's Wave Farm Radio: WGXC Radio for Open Ears which intend to make radio with art and promote the _art of listening_.

Also, radio had renewed itself through the Internet. The audio streaming technique had replaced the analogue transmitting system and artists can experiment on radio outside the legal constraints of an FM license for example. Among the webradios which are dedicated to radio art, some broadcast pieces like traditional radios. Some others directly experiment with the medium in the more concrete sense. Radio Astronomy[6] broadcast sounds taken from outer space in real time. Le Poulpe[7] is a networking experimental radio that mix several “spaces” processed and streamed through the Internet.

[1] A contemporary look on radio art by okno staff.

[2] New American Radio and Radio Art by Jacki Apple.

[3] Radio Art and its History by Victoria Fenner, Canadian sound artist and radio producer.

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title: Radio art

question: Describe radio art.

answer: Radio art is the use of radio for art. It is a form of art that is specifically composed for the medium of radio.

critique: The answer is so short that it should be rewritten

critique: The answer could be clearer about what radio art is.

critique: The answer should mention the use of radio technology.

critique: The answer fails to answer the question. It should explain what radio art is.

critique: The answer should mention the medium of radio.

critique: The answer could include a few more details about radio art.

critique: The answer should mention that radio art is aural art.

question: What does the text say about platforms for radio art?

answer: Radio art is the use of radio for art. Artists use radio technology to communicate artistic compositions for interpretation. Radio art contributes to new media art, a digitally driven art movement. Radio art projects can be collaborative including various professional sources. Some artists have approached radio as an architectural space to be constructed sonically and linguistically. Other artists have employed the media landscape itself as the narrative.

critique: The answer is irrelevant to the question.

critique: The text does not go into detail about platforms for radio art.

critique: The answer is not related to the question.

critique: It is irrelevant that radio art is the use of radio for art. Artists use radio technology to communicate artistic compositions for interpretation. Radio art contributes to new media art, a digitally driven art movement. Radio art projects can be collaborative including various professional sources. Some artists have approached radio as an architectural space to be constructed sonically and linguistically. Other artists have employed the media landscape itself as the narrative.

question: Summarize the different styles of radio art.

answer: Radio documentary, radio drama, soundscape, sound art, electroacoustic music, sound poetry, performance, open source, translation, interviews, audio galleries, soundscape, sound art, electroacoustic music, sound poetry intended for the radio, spoken word, concerts, experimental narratives, sonic geographies, pseudo documentaries, radio cinema, conceptual and multimedia performances intended for the radio.

critique: The answer should be a complete sentence.

critique: Remove the "intended for the radio" from the list, since it is redundant

critique: The answer is a copy/paste of the article.

critique: The answer is a copy-and-paste of the article.

question: What does the text say about Victoria Fenner's career?

answer: No answer

critique: The response misses to mention that Fenner is a Canadian sound artist and radio producer.


text:
     “America was founded under the Constitution in 1787. 219 years later, America abandoned the Constitution as its governing document. 1 year after that, militants seized the White House and executed most of the executive branch of government. For another 5 or 10 years, the remainder of the old Government clashed with the rebels, but eventually failed. Their only fighters were members of the U.S. Military. These men and women no longer wished to fight, and gradually they left for their families. 3 years ago, the old government surrendered. With no governing body in place, former Americans formed their own communities, generally known as principalities with the exception of the Empire of California. I used to worry about them, but once they realized that most of the US military used to lay east of the Mississippi they decided to stop there. Now, I run the Principality of York. We would have been overrun years ago if we had not chosen an old naval weapons station as our seat of power. Much to our joy upon settling, the men inside the Arleigh Burke Class destroyer Winston S. Churchill didn’t much like constantly living on a boat and agreed to merge with our community under my lead. Nobody wants to fuck with a destroyer, especially one with most of its original crew.”

     “After 3 years of strife things are starting to look up. The farms in Gloucester recognized our authority and power and provided us with food. Our recent acquisition of the Anheiser Busch plant just up the peninsula provided us with valuable beer to trade for essential goods from other principalities. Our citizens are happy for the first time in God knows how long, and you want WHAT?!”

     Emily picked her head up. “We want you to join us” she said once more. She clearly didn’t like my speech. “The York and The Potomac, if they joined together, could dominate the entire eastern seaboard!” her voice raised. I needed a drink.

     “Need a drink?” I asked her, already pouring myself one.

     “Ill pass, I will never understand your obsession with rum”

     “Just a bad habit I picked up in my college years. Listen, Emily, I have the utmost respect for you and the Principality of the Potomac, but the entire reason for the Anarchy was to get rid of tyrants” I pointed to the picture above my desk. A picture that ignited the old country, a picture of the Old President, slain, with the words “Sic Semper Tyrannis” in bright read across the middle.

     “Will you have to see the benefits here. The Churchill will only last so long until it needs to be maintained at a larger shipyard.

     “We’ll go to Nor—“

     “The Norfolk Naval base is a hellhole and you know it. The Naval Academy has been retrofitted to accommodate larger ships, we can help the Churchill.

     I swished the rum around in the glass. “It’s not going to happen” I thought for a minute. “What about a compromise: a trade agreement. You and every other leader after the Anarchy understands the importance of alcohol. Back before the Anarchy whenever there was a hurricane my dad wouldn’t stock up on anything but beer, you know why?” Emily’s eyes had glazed over, she said nothing. “Because when a tree falls on your house your neighbors will be happy to help as long as there’s beer.”

     Emily rolled her eyes, “Get to the point”

     “We get use of the Naval Academy docks once a year, in exchange you will get 10% of the Busch Brewery production”

     Emily said nothing and walked out in a huff.

     “I need some Coke to go with this” I downed the rest of the rum.

title: [RF] The Principality of York

question: What does the story say about what happened to Boston?

answer: No answer

critique: No answer is given, though it's implied that Boston is gone and Boston was not an Empire of California.

critique: There is no answer to this question because the story does not mention what happened to Boston.

critique: 'No answer' is inaccurate and needs a complete rewrite.

critique: There is plenty of information about Boston in the story.

critique: There is no evidence that the story says anything about what happened to Boston.

critique: There is no information in the text about Boston.

critique: No response is given for a response for what happened to Boston.

critique: This response is not in relation to the story

critique: There is no answer because the story does not mention what happened to Boston.

question: What does the story say about what happened to America?

answer: In 219 years following the founding of America, the government abandoned the Constitution as its governing document three years before then, a militant group executed most of the Executive branch of America in power. The remaining part of the government clashed with the rebels for a while and gradually left for their families. Without a governing body, former Americans formed new settlements called principalities with the exception of the Empire of California. With no governing body, former Americans formed new settlements with the exception of the Empire of California.

critique: "Without a governing body, former Americans formed new settlements called principalities with the exception of the Empire of California." - this is redundant

critique: We have already stated that the Empire of California formed its own principaliy.

critique: The answer does not mention that the old government surrendered.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The reason for the Anarchy was not mentioned.

critique: The final sentence is not relevant and should be omitted.

critique: "The remaining part of the government clashed with the rebels for a while and gradually left for their families. Without a governing body, former Americans formed new settlements called principalities with the exception of the Empire of California. With no governing body, former Americans formed new settlements with the exception of the Empire of California." - irrelevant information that should be deleted.

critique: The answer should mention the Empire of California.

critique: "The remnants of the old Government clashed with the rebels" is inaccurate; they fought with each other.

critique: "former Americans" - change to "former Americans"

critique: The sentence structure is a bit confusing.

critique: It is omitted that the old government surrendered three years ago.

text: "three years before then" is inaccurate

category: coherence

refinement: In 219 years following the founding of America, the government abandoned the Constitution as its governing document three years before then, a militant group executed most of the Executive branch of America in power. The remaining part of the government clashed with the rebels for a while and gradually left for their families. Without a governing body, former Americans formed new settlements called principalities with the exception of the Empire of California. With no governing body, former Americans formed new settlements with the exception of the Empire of California.

question: What does the story say about the Principality of York?

answer: The Principality of York is a city that ran the naval weapons station. The area was chosen for its cool climate. The community were two former soldiers of the five that were left of the U.S. Military Forces. They had a kingdom destroyed.

critique: The response contains inaccurate information.

critique: "The area was chosen for its cool climate. The community were two former soldiers of the five that were left of the U.S. Military Forces. They had a kingdom destroyed" is irrelevant.

critique: The community didn't have a kingdom destroyed.

critique: The answer mentions that the Principality of York had a kingdom destroyed. This is incorrect.

critique: The story does not say that the community had a kingdom destroyed.

critique: It's not clear that the community was two former soldiers of the five that were left of the U.S. Military Forces. They had a kingdom destroyed.

critique: It incorrectly mentions that the Principality's kingdom was destroyed instead of the U.S. Military Forces.

critique: "a kingdom destroyed" is a strange line of text

critique: The response is not related to the question.

critique: This response misses to mention Emily who is a prominent figure for the Principality of York.

critique: The response is inaccurate and makes up information.

question: Who is Emily and what does she want?

answer: She is acting as an emissary for Emily, who appears to be the ruling monarch or governor of the Potomac. Emily wants Julian to join herself and every other ruler after the anarchy to dominate the eastern seaboard. She seems to enjoy attacking anyone in way over their heads because of the Churchill's size and strength.

critique: Emily speaks for both herself and her state.

critique: Julian is fictional, there is no-one ruling York

critique: The answer does not mention the proposed compromise.

critique: Emily is not the ruling monarch or governor of the Potomac.

critique: The size of the Churchill and its crew are not mentioned in the story.

critique: Emily is not acting as an emissary. She is the leader of the Potomac.

critique: 'attack anyone in way over their heads' makes no sense. Also, Emily doesn't seem to enjoy attacking anyone.

critique: It is not stated that she enjoys attacking anyone in a certain way.

critique: Emily's plan to dominate the eastern seaboard is not stated in the text.


text:
So this is the first time I've ever written any fiction. The story, well it isn't really a story, it's kind of an opening or just me playing around. Have a look and tell me if my style of writing is ok or any tips for just starting out? Cheers :)
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It was a grey and miserable Saturday afternoon. It had been raining all morning and the sun had yet to make a real appearance. In Trafalgar square there were thousands gathered, crowding around the monuments and spilling out into nearby streets. Although this was the largest protest currently going on in the UK similar scenes could be seen in more than thirty cities nationwide. Near the front of the loud, chanting and aggravated crowd was a girl displaying all three of these with what seemed like as much vigour as the rest of the crowd combined. The rain ran off her hair, down her face and dripped from her chin; she had been outside since dawn and was freezing. Lucinda, as her mother called her, or Lucy as her friends called her, was wearing a long white coat with fur around the hood. It was zipped up against the strong winds and went to just above her knees, below that were skinny jeans and then bright red Converse trainers. Her face was made-up but only subtly focusing mainly on her eyes and she wore only one piece of jewellery: a thin chain with a pendant representing a double-thumbed fist clenching a Peyote button, a symbol popularised by her favourite author at the time.
Lucy stood with her placard held high, a hand written message on a large white board glued to an old table leg she had found in her garage and held with both hands. On the board was a potent slogan which could have been seen for the past year or so on bus stops, on billboards or broadcast on television, certain YouTube channels and blogs. The slogan was simply: ‘Talent is earned, not bought’. This was a protest against a relatively recent trend which saw people pay for a procedure which altered their genes and improved them in almost any area they wished.

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In the year 2022 a company which developed from a subsidiary of a large pharmaceutical company focused on gene therapy to prevent and cure a range of genetic diseases stumbled upon a method to replace the current DNA in a person with other DNA. And separately, a different part of the company worked with a method to alter and splice current genes together. These methods combined allowed Aspire Inc. to improve the physical characteristics of a person to that of the current best person whose genes they were able to get access to. Of course they would only have the potential of that person and would still have to train to improve whatever skill they required. These abilities ranged from becoming physically stronger or being able to run more quickly to having a better memory or being exceptional at mathematics. The methods used remain the property of Aspire Inc. entirely.
By 2030 this process had been all but perfected and the company had hundreds of thousands of genes available to choose from to improve whomever they wished in whatever way they wished. Testing had proven safe and it was a matter of months before the process, known colloquially as ‘bettering yourself’, was commercially available. Initially the idea was praised and lauded by the population as one which would be the next great leap in human advancement since the internet. By the year 2032 there were two clinics in the world, one in London and one in New York, where a person could book an appointment, pay £100,000 per trait, and be seen and finished within 24 weeks. Depending on popularity, Aspire Inc. were planning to build more clinics worldwide. Their treatment was very popular, for those who could afford it.

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title: Never written fiction before. How's my style? (600 words)

question: Summarize the themes of this story.

answer: The themes of this story are the dangers of genetic modification and the dangers of capitalism. The story is set in a world where people can pay to have their genes modified to be better at whatever they want. The narrator is protesting against this practice, which they see as a danger to humanity. The narrator also seems to be protesting against capitalism, as they are protesting in a public square.

critique: The narrator is not protesting against capitalism.

critique: The themes are not the dangers of genetic modification and the dangers of capitalism. The story is set in a world where people can pay to have their genes modified to be better at whatever they want. The narrator is protesting against this practice, which they see as a danger to humanity. The narrator also seems to be protesting against capitalism, as they are protesting in a public square.

critique: The narrator is not protesting against capitalism

critique: "The narrator is protesting against this practice, which they see as a danger to humanity. The narrator also seems to be protesting against capitalism, as they are protesting in a public square." - these sentences seem redundant and could be removed.

critique: "The narrator also seems to be protesting against capitalism, as they are protesting in a public square." - this is incorrect. Lucy was protesting against the practice of paying for a procedure that alters a person's genes and improves them in almost any area they wish. She was not protesting capitalism.

critique: "The narrator also seems to be protesting against capitalism, as they are protesting in a public square." - this is incorrect because the narrator is a fictional character.

question: Summarize how Lucy specifically comes into play in this story.

answer: Lucy is protesting against the practice of "bettering yourself" by Aspire Inc. She is protesting against the practice of paying for a procedure that alters your genes and improves you in almost any area you wish. She is protesting against the practice of paying for a procedure that alters your genes and improves you in almost any area you wish. She is protesting against the practice of paying for a procedure that alters your genes and improves you in almost any area you wish.

critique: This is a repetitive answer and should be re-written.

critique: The repetition of the same sentence is unnecessary.

text: This answer should point out how Lucy is exemplifying the general displeasure of the genetic modifications.

question: Summarize the source of tension in the story.

answer: The source of tension in the story is the fact that people are paying for a procedure that alters their genes and improves them in almost any area they wish. The procedure is known as "bettering yourself". The procedure is safe and the company that developed it, Aspire Inc., plans to build more clinics worldwide. The procedure is very popular, but only for those who can afford it.

critique: The answer is a summary of the story, not necessarily the source of tension.

critique: The answer should mention the protagonist's role in the story.

critique: "People are paying for a procedure" is redundant, because these two phrases mean the same thing.

critique: "The procedure is safe and the company that developed it, Aspire Inc., plans to build more clinics worldwide." - this is incorrect. The procedure is safe, and Aspire Inc. plans to build more clinics, but they are not the ones who developed the procedure.

text: The answer should mention how the backlash against the procedure provides the tension in the story.


text:
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From the latest red carpet buzz to introducing innovative ideas to improve your lifestyle, Valerie Greenberg is an expert on pop culture and what’s trending. Valerie has interviewed an impressive roster of A-List celebrities some of which include: Howard Stern, The Late Joan Rivers, Rosario Dawson, Adrian Grenier, Eli Manning, Victor Cruz and Amare Stoudemire. At the Tony Awards upon her first days working as a stringer reporter for _US WEEKLY_, she was the sole print journalist to successfully interview Oprah on the red carpet.  Since then she has evolved into a media maven who is committed to creating powerful, inspiring and confidence boosting content, which is how she came up with her business and motto…YouvebeenVALidated.

She regularly hosts women entrepreneurial live events such as _THE WOMEN IN TOYS GALA_ held in New York City honoring women toy makers and licensees as well as in-store events for luxury brands such as Swarovski (a fan favorite of many celebs) and concerts for musicians looking to make their mark in the Big Apple. Known for her unique ability to introduce, connect and give access to consumers to the latest Luxe for Less beauty, fashion and lifestyle products and diy trends, Greenberg is also a QVC approved guest.

She regularly appears on television news and lifestyle programs around the country, sharing her entertainment know-how, highlighting the hottest trends and problem solving solutions. You can catch her on _GOOD MORNING AMERICA, THE WENDY WILLIAMS SHOW_, INSIDE EDITION, DR. OZ, _AMAZON_, _PIX 11 NEWS_, _FOX NEWS AND_ _THE WALL STREET JOURNAL’S_ digital platform.  She’s also guest co-hosted the podcast produced by IHEART Radio’s Elvis Duran called Celebrity Buzz starring Rob Shuter and Garrett Vo from Z100.

She has been featured in and contributed to publications such as _BUSINESS WEEK, THE NEW YORK POST, THE DAILY NEWS_, _US WEEKLY_, _IN TOUCH WEEKLY_, _LIFE AND STYLE WEEKLY_, _DAILY MAIL_, _YAHOO NEWS_ and _AOL_. Visit her at http://youvebeenvalidated.com

question: What does the article say about Valerie Greenberg?

answer: Valerie Greenberg is an expert on pop culture and what's trending. She interviews an impressive list of A-list celebrities for various news and lifestyle shows.

critique: The answer should include some of the shows she's appeared on.

critique: The list of celebrities is not relevant.

critique: Rephrase to make the sentence flow better

critique: It's omitted that she has been on Good Morning America, Wendy Williams, and Inside Edition.

critique: The answer should mention Valerie's merchandising business.

critique: The answer should mention the name of Greenberg's business.

critique: It is omitted that she hosts women entrepreneurial live events.

critique: The response misses to mention that Greenberg is also a lifestyle and entertainment expert.

critique: The answer could include more information about Valerie Greenberg.

critique: The highlighted part of the answer needs to contain all of the information about Valerie.

question: What does the article say about Greenberg's personal life?

answer: No answer

critique: "No answer" is a response that should have some words written to arrive at a proper one.

critique: The article mentions that Greenberg is married and that she has a son.

critique: The response misses to mention that Greenberg is a lifestyle and entertainment expert, media personality, and on-air host.

critique: It is incorrect that there is no information on Greenberg's personal life.

critique: There is information in the article that can be used to answer this question.

critique: The answer is false. Greenberg's personal life is revealed throughout the article.

critique: The article does not mention her personal life.

critique: No answer is given but the text does mention Greenberg's personal life.