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Strange Encounters

"It's weird officer, real weird." Mark Henderson was at the local police station in Alberton, Ontario on 4: 36am August 8th, 1951. Strangely enough, a building he's never seen, in a town he's never been to before, yet familiar.

"All right smooth talker, let's take it from the top once more. I know there's not much to it as you've continued to repeat but let's see if anything else pops out at you and then we will pay for your gas home." Officer Dan Richardson was becoming more and more tired with the story was hearing.

There just can't be anyway. Dan thought becoming more and more enraged within. The moment he walks out of here I'm just going to throw this case out. Hocus pocus my ass, what does he take me for, an idiot?! At best this is the best damn way to get free gas.

"Well like I said before, I had just filled up at half past 10pm, so I could drive out and get to the place that sells tobacco by the pound still..."

Yes, yes we all go out to New Market for cheaper cigarettes, not relevant.

"...and I was driving out to Bakersfield like I said,"
He didn't refer to it as Bakersfield before? The puzzled Officer thought.

"...on the way there I had to swerved out of the way of a truck with these god forsaken bright lights. I guess I was a bit sleepy Officer and woke up in the nick of time but after that I found myself just driving around an unfamiliar road.

I was having awful headaches, for a bit around that time too. Images that started accompanying them are hard to distinguish but almost always included me in a white setting... I don't know it sounds crazy now. Anyways, I pulled over till they subsided and drove straight here in hopes that you could help me figure out where I am so I can get home, but I still can't remember where that was again. Some rest will cure this forgetfulness. I feel like I've been up all night." Mark felt like that was all the information that he could give, he couldn't remember what town he lived in nor his wife or his phone number. He kind of felt a helpless feeling fall over him.

"We'll now that you've told us where you were driving to we can call that regions station and see if there is a match to your name anywhere close to there. It should only take a few hours."

Not long after that another Office came into the room and asked if Officer Dan could speak with him for a moment.
What did the results turn up Frank?

"He wasn't lying when he said things were weird. It turns out that there isn't  even a Bakersfeild anywhere near here. In fact, you have to drive 14 hours north to get to a small town called Bakersfeild." Officer Frank said as he started to debrief.

"...here's where things get truly disturbing. When we searched his name through the local police department Mark has a missing person out because his wife...."

"Wow, his wife sure gets worried quickly. Seems a bit much don't you think he's only been gone for half a day at most. Can't remember his name or town he lives in, probably doesn't remember setting out on a road trip. Likely to get away from her if she's that crazy." Office Dan remarked crudely as if this was all an elaborate funny joke.

"If you'd let me finish, his wife reported him missing August 8th, 1950, sir. This was reported after she spent a full day returning home from a place that was 8 hours away from their town. She reported being in the passenger seat of a driverless car after being at a gas station for an unknown reason. All she could remember before waking up was that there was a blinding white light that she couldn't help but look at. It actually says 'forced' in the report." Frank said growing more and grimmer as he read from the file between his trembling hands.

Officer Dan, started to sit in the closest seat he could find. He couldn't believe that Mark was 14 hours away from home. That would make his whole time scale false. Not to mention the fact that he has been missing for a full year, a full year exactly he would later realize.

He began to think about the crazy aspects of them all, his wife's story at the time; driverless cars, being at a gas station for no reason, it all makes sense now, only after hearing Marks story.

"Sir there is one more thing in the reports." Frank said with a grave look in his eyes.

"What more could it be?"

"The wife had three cuts into her skin going the length of her back; she said that's the first appearance  of them in her life. It was like they were skillfully cut as the doctors said there was no way any doctor could stitch a cut that clean without some kind of pain. She reported none."

"All right Frank thanks for all the intel." Dan has a hard enough time giving gratitude in the first place and was finding it particularly challenging to give it with what he just learned.

The door opens to the interrogation; with it brought an energy that mimetic death. Officer Dan began relaying the frightening news to Mark, which still hasn't sunk in, himself.
"One last thing before we send you on your way home to your wife, if you will Mark. Your wife reported three cuts on her back that she had never seen before that night. Could you remove your shirt and pants please, I just want to know if we should have medical look at you first." Officer Dan asked Mark in the most genuine and sincere way he could.

"No problem Sir, it was starting to itch a bit anyways. It'll be nice to readjust it." Mark said in a cheerful way. For he sees this all as a blessing. Finally, he can see his wife and start the laughing process.

As Office Dan brought his coffee cup down from a big deep, delicious gulp, the liquid left his mouth as fast as it came in. in one fellow motion Office Dan vomited, dropped his cup, and tripped on his own two feet.

With his eyes wide open from shock; he gazed at a man whose skin, from head to toe, was scalped. Only his muscles were visible. Each and every muscle strand picked clean of its protective layer of skin. No blood was seeping through, it was as if there was its own invisible skin that covered him. Which is likely why he hasn't miraculously died.

As Mark turned around to confront a mirror, the last thing to pass through his mind was his beautiful wife; he pictured the way her soft cherry red hair flowed over her shoulders like a creek over an edge. Her rosy cheeks gently glowing in the sun. It was comforting to his mind to have such a lovely mental image cross it because once his  eyes focused on the mirror, his hideously deformed body sent his body into a trauma that it couldn't handle and  at  10:29PM August 8th Mark Henderson collapsed dead.

As for Dan Richardson, well he wishes that the story ended there.

title: [SF] Strange Encounters

question: Summarize the source of tension in the story.

answer: At the beginning of the story, a man named Mark shows up at the police station with nobody having any idea of where he came from or why he is there. He seems disoriented, but appears to hold on to his identity, at least at the beginning. As he tells his story, it's revealed that he stated getting lost three years earlier. It appears his wife was in the car with him at that time, as she reported a similar scenario, however, she was missing for a year.

critique: The answer is incorrect. Mark was missing for a year, not three years.

critique: It is omitted that when Officer Dan questions the man to remove his shirt and reveals that he is missing his skin. (And metal rods are instead what supports his muscles.)

critique: The response inaccurately mentions that Mark's wife was missing for three years, however it was only a year.

critique: The answer is incorrect. Mark's wife was not in the car with him three years ago. She was in the car with him the night he disappeared.

critique: This is incorrect. The woman was missing for a year and the story happened in 1951, not three years earlier.

critique: The story does not state that Mark stated getting lost three years earlier.

critique: The story does not state that Mark got lost three years earlier.

critique: The response inaccurately mentions that Mark stated getting lost three years earlier, however he was missing for a year.

text: It is omitted that Mark does at the end od the story.


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(This is a work in progress but I wanted to get some feedback on what people think might be good additions to the story and even whether or not to try and finish it XD)

"I am known by many names but my first was Judas...

After betraying that wretch "Jesus", his father cursed me by casting Legion into my soul. I was destined to roam these lands wreaking havoc by breeding new monsters. I couldn't stand the pain of Legion so I attempted suicide to no avail, doing so only strengthened Legion's control over me, imbuing me with new even more menacing and rotten powers. Each time I attempt to end all this madness, Legion grows ever so much stronger, forcing me to spawn creatures even more vile than the last just to stay "in control". We were the first...HE was the source!...The original evil. I try my best to keep them at bay, but Legion shall not be halted in their mission, God's mission, to rot every soul on this forsaken planet. I am the one thing holding Legion back from swallowing this whole pitiful universe down his foul gullet. Call me what you will, evil, devil, Satan...but I am your true savior, for I bear the worst of all, I am the container of the most vile, wretched evil the world has ever known. If not for me you would all be sentenced to a life in the nether reaches of Hell!"

As the Old One said this he let out a gut wrenching wail and fell to his knees. Then, as if nothing had happened, he rose again looking even more menacing than before.

"We thank you kindly young mortals, I am finally free from our prison. As a token of my gratitude, your souls shall be the last we devour! Farewell...we have a plane to catch."

And with that he burst into smoke and flew off into the night.

"Ahahahaha!..."

As the old one's laughter faded, Cameron and Zane could do nothing but stare in shock. They had just unleashed the most nefarious evil that ever existed, and set it out on it's quest to destroy all in it's path. Screams of children, the echoes of death, the endless darkness that was to come; all of this flooded into their minds.

"Zane...what have we done?"

"...I think we just started the Apocalypse, Cam. Dad's not gonna be happy about this..."

As Zane utters this a dark figure speaks to Cameron and Zane. "Looks like you boys need a little help..."

"And just who is offering?", says Zane.

The figure steps forward as the shadows flow off her body. "Name's Kasdeja, but you boys can call me Kassie."

"Ha! Look miss that's a nice offer but we wouldn't want you to get hurt, so we'll deal with this ourselves" (Zane)

Then the woman's feminine curves morph into a grotesque skeletal figure holding a giant blood-drenched scythe. "Do I look the part now?", Kassie says this in her true voice which sends ripples of terror through both Cameron and Zane's souls.

"Zane, I think we might want to hear her out.." (Cam)

Kassie suddenly returns to her human form, "Yea Zane, you really should listen to me...or I could just reap your soul now and save you all the trouble of living", Kassie says this in a very girlish voice making light of the situation and seeming almost human again.
"Now, to start business...we need you two boys to.."

"And just who is we?" Zane interrupts.

"Oh, I almost forgot to introduce my brothers..you know you guys need to stop hiding it's not nice to sneak up on people" As she says this three figures appear behind Cameron and Zane seemingly out of thin air. "Let me introduce you to my brothers, Arkas (the man on the left bows), Azazel (the man on the right bows), and last but certainly not least, Sh..."

"Orion" (the man in the back says this interrupting Kassie and glaring at her scornfully)

"Yes, Orion...the fallen prince. Cameron, Zane, we are what your people refer to as the horsemen" (Kassie)

"As in the four horsemen?" (Cameron)

"Yep, in the flesh...well mostly" (Arkas says this as a piece of flesh falls from his arm) "Still working on the whole human form thing..."

"Arkas, I truly doubt you'll ever get the hang of that" (Azazel) "At any rate, Arkas here is known for begin the bringer of famine and pestilence, myself I am the embodiment of rage and war, you've already found out Kassie here is the reaper, death itself; and lastly there's Orion, and he...well I'll let him tell you who he is"

"I am the lord of conquest and the leader of this little band of misfits" (Orion)

"So exactly what are you guys?" (Zane)

"We are the last of the nephilim, the spawn of angels and humans...the perfect race if you will." (Orion)

"The last? So what happened to the rest of your kind?" (Cameron)

"We killed them..." (Kassie)

"Why would you slaughter all of your kind? Did you want to make yourselves extinct?!?!" (Zane)

"We were...given the opportunity to stop that from happenning, which is the only reason any of us are still alive" (Azazel)

"The council tasked us with stopping the ancient war between Heaven and Hell; in exchange for clearing the battlefield of our bretheren, we were given the power to end the war and uphold the treaty that was to be put in place. (Orion)

"So what was this treaty all about then?" (Cam)

"In a nut shell...it prevented the armies of Heaven and Hell from destroying all life in their conquests for reign over this plane." (Kassie)

"And you mean to tell me that the armies of Heaven and Hell just agreed to stop fighting like two little kids being scolded?" (Zane)

"There was no discussion, the edicts of the Council rule over all...they had  no choice but to obey." (Orion)

"And just who in the flying fuck is this "Council", must not be very important if we've never ran across them" (Zane)

"Mind your tongue mortal, the Council may find you crucial to our cause but I am not above slaying you for your blatant disrespect for those who stand beween you and certain obliteration!" (Orion)

"Calm down Mister sensitive, ignore him Zane he couldn't hurt you if he wanted to." (Arkas)

"At any rate, the Council is our government if you will, they set the laws for this plane and we enforce them. This treaty is one of these such laws, and it assures that war shall not be declared on Earth until the mortals are evolved enough to defend themselves." (Kassie)

"So, how does the Council know when we are ready for such a war?" (Cam)

"This is where your problem lies, the Council set up 14 seals which were to prevent the apocalypse from beginning, however, only half of these seals need to be broken for the treaty to be nullified.."

"Let me guess, we are only one seal away from needing to kiss our collective ass goodbye.." (Zane)

"Oh come now Zane, you act as if you life is always a cliché. Not a single seal has been broken....well, that was true until you let the genie out of his bottle" (As Kassie says this she playfully gestures toward the empty coffin just feet from Cam and Zane)

title: "The Old One" - A Supernatural/Mythos based story

question: Summarize a plot surprise in the story.

answer: The Old One is revealed to be the Devil, Lucifer.

critique: The Old One is not revealed to be the Devil, Lucifer.

critique: The Old One is not revealed to be Lucifer, but Legion.

critique: The response is not completely accurate. Judas is the one who states his name: "I am known by many names but my first was Judas...".

critique: There is no evidence that the Old One is the Devil, Lucifer.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The Old One is not Lucifer.

critique: The Old One is not revealed to be Lucifer.

critique: The Old One isn't revealed to be Lucifer, but the horsemen reveal themselves to be the last of the Nephilim.


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NICHOLAS PETER WARNER (born 22 May 1950 in Singapore) is an Australian diplomat, intelligence official, public servant, and the Director-General of the Office of National Intelligence since 20 December 2018.[1][2]

Warner served as the Director-General of the Office of National Assessments from December 2017 to December 2018, the Director-General Australian Secret Intelligence Service (ASIS) from August 2009 to December 2017, and the Secretary of the Australian Department of Defence from December 2006 to August 2009.[3] He is best known and highly respected for his role in “RAMSI” as the Special Coordinator of the Regional Assistance Mission to Solomon Islands.

Education

Born in Singapore, Warner holds a Bachelor of Arts degree with honours in History and Asian Studies and a Master of Arts degree in History from the Australian National University (ANU).

Career

Joint Intelligence Organisation (JIO):

-   (1973–77) Worked in the JIO

Office of National Assessments (ONA):

-   (1979–88), Deputy Head, Current Intelligence Branch and National Assessments Officer for Africa
-   (1980) Australian Liaison Office, Salisbury, Rhodesia

Department of Foreign Affairs and Trade (DFAT):

-   (1988–89) Director, South Asia, Africa, Middle East Trade Section
-   (1989–90) Head, Australian Liaison Office, Namibia during the Australian contribution to UNTAG
-   (1990–91) Director, Central and Southern Africa Section
-   (1991–93) Deputy Head of Mission, Australian Permanent Mission to the Supreme National Council, Cambodia
-   (1994–97) Australian Ambassador to Iran
-   (1997–98) Assistant Secretary, Parliamentary and Media Branch and Senior Spokesman
-   (1997–98) Acting First Assistant Secretary, Public Affairs and Consular Division
-   (1998–99) First Assistant Secretary, South and South East Asia Division
-   (1999–2003) High Commissioner, Papua New Guinea[4]
-   (2003) First Assistant Secretary, South Pacific, Africa and Middle East Division
-   (2003–2004) Special Coordinator of the Regional Assistance Mission to Solomon Islands (RAMSI)
-   (2004–2005) Deputy Secretary, Department of Foreign Affairs and Trade

Prime Minister's Office (PMO):

-   (2005–2006) Senior Adviser (International) to the Prime Minister

Australian Department of Defence:

-   (4 December 2006-August 2009) Secretary of Defence

Department of Foreign Affairs and Trade (DFAT):

-   (17 August 2009 – 18 December 2017) Director-General, Australian Secret Intelligence Service (ASIS)[5]

Department of the Prime Minister and Cabinet (PM&C):

-   (18 December 2017-20 December 2018) Director-General of the Office of National Assessments (ONA)
-   (20 December 2018-) Director-General of the Office of National Intelligence (ONI)

Honours

Warner was awarded the Public Service Medal in 2006 for outstanding public service as High Commissioner to Port Moresby, Special Coordinator for the Regional Assistance Mission to Solomon Islands and leader of the Emergency Response Team which dealt with the kidnapping in Baghdad of Mr Douglas Wood.[6] On 13 June 2011, he was named an Officer of the Order of Australia for distinguished service to public sector leadership through the development of policy, administration and reform in the areas of intelligence, defence and international relations.[7]

[1] “Maintaining a Strong and Secure Australia” Prime Minister of Australia press release, 1 December 2017

[2] “Malcolm Turnbull names spy chief Nick Warner to lead new security agency” The Canberra Times, 1 December 2017

[3] CDF thanks Nick Warner, Defence Media release MSPA 264/09, 13 August 2009. defence.gov.au

[4]

[5] ASIS Director General - Position Bio. asis.gov.au

[6]

[7]

title: Nick Warner

question: Describe some of the roles that Nick Warner held in the Department of Foreign Affairs and Trade.

answer: Some of the roles that Nick Warner held in the Department of Foreign Affairs and Trade were Director, South Asia, Africa, Middle East Trade Section, Head, Australian Liaison Office, Namibia during the Australian contribution to UNTAG, Director, Central and Southern Africa Section, Deputy Head of Mission, Australian Permanent Mission to the Supreme National Council, Cambodia, and Australian Ambassador to Iran.

critique: The answer should mention that he was the Director-General of the Australian Secret Intelligence Service.

question: Describe some of the honors that were given to Nick Warner.

answer: Some of the honors that were given to Nick Warner were the Public Service Medal in 2006, and the Officer of the Order of Australia in 2011.

critique: The answer should mention the Public Service Medal.

critique: In addition to the two given, he was also named a

question: What would Mr. Douglas Wood think about Nick Warner?

answer: Mr. Douglas Wood would probably be very pleased to learn that Warner became Director-General of the Office of National Intelligence, and that he is best known for his role in RAMSI as the Special Coordinator of the Regional Assistance Mission to Solomon Islands. Warner was awarded the Public Service Medal in 2006 for outstanding public service as High Commissioner to Port Moresby, Special Coordinator for the Regional Assistance Mission to Solomon Islands and leader of the Emergency Response Team which dealt with the kidnapping in Baghdad of Mr. Douglas Wood.

critique: floods the page with extraneous information that does not answer the question

critique: The highlighted text is irrelevant to the question and should be removed.


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Rider

My mom has always been supportive of my career as a musician. My dad never got around to it. The only bands he’d ever listen to were the Beatles and Rolling Stones. He wanted the Beatles played at his funeral, which he got. My mom never talks about the music that she listens to  except for her uncle Alan who toured the Midwest in the 50’s as a troubadour;  he’s still famous in our town.

I haven’t been home in a while, not that I miss it much. I moved to LA when I was 23. I was bored by the people at home. I was bored by my job at the grocery store and tired of not seeing anything. When I moved I had most of my” LA-experiences” during the first six months, right drugs- wrong people, that sort of thing. I thought the substances would inspire me as it seemed to inspire others but that never happened. I also played some gigs with local small-timers but it didn't amount to much.

My fourth summer in LA came around and thats when I met Terrie outside a used-car shop. I’d been looking to replace dad’s station-wagon that I’d driven to the coast. As  I was standing there looking over some of my options I saw the glint of peroxide-blonde hair and sweaty fishnet stockings out of the corner of my eye. I remember the coral lipstick, which I later learned was her favorite, so shiny on those lips. She walked up to me to bum a cigarette. As I’d recently quit smoking I apologized and told her I didn’t have any on me. Disappointed, she asked me for a lighter to borrow if she could bum a smoke from a man that was standing by a newsstand across the street. I didn’t have a lighter either but I reached into my vest pocket for the book of matches I always kept there. As I handed it to her she thanked me and smiled in the most heartbreaking way. I knew that I had to make her mine. Although I was more of what you might call the singer-songwriter type than a rocker, this girl with her glam rock look was something else. Underneath that make up I could see that she was pretty in an old-fashioned way. Later, when we were married, I used to tell her that she was like a burning wheat field blowing in the summer wind; she never understood what I meant and said I was a sucker. Our courtship was quick because her parents were very religious. Terrie was only 21 when we married but they consented and gave us their blessing because I was “a good God-fearing Midwestern boy.”

	Through Terrie I got more involved in the scene and discovered I had a knack for writing catchy riffs. I joined some of the locals who were in need of a guitarist and not long after that we played as support band for a famous band on their US tour. Months of touring and debauchery followed but after rising tensions in the band and disagreements with our management we decided to call it quits.

         Then Terrie got pregnant. She was excited but seeing as her job at the record store didn’t pay much and my being unemployed, I was worried to say the least. Fortunately I lucked out in joining as a touring and studio session guitarist with a band that had just signed  deal with a big label. Unfortunately this meant being on the road for long stretches at a time. Things quickly went downhill in our relationship and it was while touring in Japan that I got the terrible news that Terrie had suffered a miscarriage. She was inconsolable and quit her job. I tried to be home as much as I could to care for her but my obligations took me out of town again. Things between us never recovered after that and I blame myself. Two months after the loss of our child I got a call from Roy, a sergeant in the Marines who tells me he’s in love with my wife and she is in love with him and they are going to Germany. While this news hurt at first I can’t say I was surprised; I kept my nose to the grind to give me something else to think about. One tour lead to another and after 5 years the band went through a lineup change and I was thrust into the role of frontman. Evidently I did something right as we quickly started selling out the largest arenas and stadiums. We got through 3 good tours before ticket sales started to dwindle. These days we play to fairly large clubs and such, I don’t complain, seeing as it brings in good money. I live a private and enjoyable life.
	I’ve never met Terrie since our marriage ended but last I heard Roy was killed in a combat exercise and she had gotten remarried to a journalist. Even though our relationship went to pieces I still cherish terrie and our times together.
	At the venues we play the band usually has extensive requirements to ensure their comfort. My only requests on the rider are one ham sandwich and two fingers of bourbon. I usually go out into whichever city we’re playing that night and walk around while eating my sandwich. Even though the band is still fairly popular people seldom recognize me off the stage. I also try to find a bookstore to buy something by a local author for those long flights and bus rides. Just before showtime I’ll find a quiet spot in the venue and raise a glass for my Terrie.

title: "Rider"

question: What does the story say about the band's bassist?

answer: No answer

critique: The response misses to provide an answer to the task.

critique: The response misses to mention that the story does not say anything about the band's bassist.

critique: The response misses to answer the question.

question: What does the story say about the narrator?

answer: The narrator is a musician. He moved to LA when he was 23 and got married to Terrie when he was 26. He joined a band as a guitarist and toured with them for a while. He eventually became the frontman of the band. The narrator cherishes his memories with Terrie and still thinks about her sometimes.

critique: The narrator is not 26 when he marries Terrie.

critique: Arranged sex between the narrator and Terrie

question: What happened between the narrator and Terrie?

answer: They got married at a young age and had a miscarriage. Terrie lost interest in their relationship and found a new love.

critique: The answer should mention that Terrie leaves the narrator.

critique: The answer should mention that Terrie left the narrator for a marine.

critique: The second sentence, in particular, is inaccurate

critique: The miscarriage was two months after the loss of their child.

critique: The narrator and Terrie's relationship fell apart because he was always away touring.

critique: It's omitted that the narrator was on tour for long stretches.

question: What does the story say about the narrator's early career?

answer: The narrator moved to LA at 23. He played gigs with local small-timers but it didn't amount to much. He lucked out in joining as a touring and studio session guitarist with a band that had just signed a deal with a big label. Unfortunately, this meant being on the road for long stretches of time.

critique: The answer should mention the narrator's marriage to Terrie.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator became the frontman of the band.

critique: It's omitted that he joined some of the locals who were in need of a guitarist and not long after that they played as support band for a famous band on their US tour.

critique: It's omitted the band broke up and the narrator joined another band with a frontman position.

critique: The response is missing the part about the narrator's marriage to Terrie.

critique: It's omitted that he became the frontman of the band.


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Dead ahead all that could be seen was open road and darkness, as if the world had been swallowed up by an inkwell, seeping in around the light. The low hum of a sunflower yellow Vespa SS 180 Scooter reverberated around the canyon walls as white headlights pierced the night, like an angel churning through the abyss. The wind howled through the ravine, giving life to a place that had none for centuries. Faint lights streamed across the darkened sky, ships moving like shooting stars to some unknown destination. An orange hue appeared on the horizon at the end of the canyon, giving the sky a demonic glow. As the rider approached the light, a sharp ring echoed inside her amber helmet, interrupting the ambiance and peace. With a light touch on the helmet near the temple, the dialing stopped. “What do you want Trenton?!” the rider snapped in agitation. “Clair… something doesn't feel right about this…” Trenton stammered with apprehension in his voice. There was a silent air between the two of them as the Vespa rumbled on. “Listen Clair, I know we left on bad terms but… this Anubis guy… I don’t trust a word he says! Talking about some crashed cargo… why would cargo need a radioactive check? It just doesn't add up…” The moon emerged from beyond a canyon wall, giving a quick glimpse towards Clair; a watchful eye from above. “Clair… are you even listening to me?” Trenton breathed into his headset, his ear full of the roaring of an engine. “I can handle this! Besides… we need the money, or did you forget about that already?” Clair snapped, her temper at the end of its fuse. The canyon walls faded away behind her as the wreckage of the cargo entered her view. “I've got to go Trenton… I’ll call you when I’m done” She touched the temple of her helmet again, silencing the call.

Smoke filled the nearby air as she approached the wreckage, letting off an ember-like sheen on her helmet. With a quick touch to her chinstrap, the facemask lifted upwards, letting Clair free from the constraints of safety. Her hazel eyes pierced into the wreckage, reflecting the flames like panes of glass. With a methodical twist, Clair reached into a satchel attached to the back of the Vespa, taking out a respirator. In one swift motion, the mask was over her face, muffling her breath, putting her back into safety’s embrace. Always gotta be behind some sort of mask… Clair thought to herself as she unbuckled the radiation detector from her hip. Another ship roared by overhead, blotting out part of the moon’s gaze. Her eyes became fixated upon the fire in front of her, tracing the outline of the object; cylindrical in shape and black as onyx, but hard to make out definite shapes in the darkness. The flames reflected off of its glossy surface, dancing around wildly. As the light whipped back and forth against the monolith, the faint hints of an engraving shimmered, forcing Clair’s eyes to become entranced. It seems like it is pulsating… like the flames are making it live. A cold wind ran up her spine as she attempted to decipher the engraving.

Another ring echoed throughout her helmet, causing her to stumble backwards into her Vespa, knocking it off of its stand. “Fucking shit Trenton!” Clair screamed as she scrambled to pick up her bike, the ringing still making itself known. She threw her radiation detector onto the ground towards the crash site and proceeded to attempt to steady the Vespa back onto its kickstand. As the Vespa was tilted upright, a quiet chirping sound permeated the air, battling with the ringing of Clair’s headset, both sounds fighting for her attention. Quickly, Clair lightly touched the temple of her helmet as she approached the radiation detector. “Listen Trenton I told you before, I’ll call you when I—“.  Heavy static filled her headset as she grabbed her radiation detector, filling her world with white noise. Clair snatched up the device and scanned over the details as the static continued to scratch at her eardrums. “Trenton… I’m not sure if you’re hearing me but… this is a big one”. Her words were met by a spiteful hiss, an answer with no voice. In agitation, Clair tossed her helmet to the side, letting the static fill the night air instead of her head.

She crept closer to the monolith, unsteady in her footsteps, constantly staring at the shimmering engraving. As she approached the debris, the watchful gaze of the moon faded behind the shimmering oil-like surface of the wreckage, filling her gaze with hellish colors. With each step closer, the chirping grew louder, but Clair could not help but be drawn towards it. The air around her grew thick with fog and a glowing aura as she closed in on the structure. There was no one else there but her and the symbol that was staring back at her. She began to trace her finger along the lines, her touch bringing color to a seemingly colorless enigma. The surface was smooth and malleable to the touch, as if made up of some dense oil. As the color returned to the relic, a glowing eye was staring back at her, pulsating with the flickering flames dance. The eye caught hers, and caused Clair to trip over herself as she fell backwards, shocked at the new detail. The radiation detector was chirping so quickly that it appeared a flock of birds was swarming her senses, overwhelming her perception. The eye seemed to look down towards Clair, as if determining her worth, but she was lost in her gaze, frozen in shock. “Who… has awakened me?!” the monolith bellowed, a gust of air flowing from its figure towards Clair, tossing her hair around wildly. “Wh-What are you!” Clair screamed as she crawled backwards into her Vespa, grasping its frame for stability. In response, the eye pulsed brighter and brighter, seemingly growing in size as it consumed the area around it, as if feeding off of the world. Clair leapt to her feet desperately and hopped aggressively onto her Vespa, almost knocking it over again in the process. With a hard twist on the throttle, her engine ripped through the night air, leaving a trail of dust and smoke behind her, and sending her away from the monstrosity. The air around her seemed to grow colder as the gaze of the moon faded behind the horizon, making her bleak headlights the only comfort left for her in the world.

title: [SF] A Lost Cause

question: What does the story say about the protagonists' mission relating to radiation?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that they are checking radiation levels.

critique: The answer should mention the radiation detector.

critique: The story does mention a mission relating to radiation and the protagonist.

question: What does the story say about the origins of the creature that Clair finds?

answer: No answer

critique: The response misses to answer the question.

critique: The monolith wakes up and requests its name.

critique: The creature is an ancient relic of an alien civilization.

critique: The response misses to provide an answer to the task.

critique: The answer should mention the creature's origins.

critique: The response misses to mention that the creature is an ancient monolith that has been awakened.

question: What does the story say about Clair's relationship with Trenton?

answer: Trenton and Clair left on bad terms. Trenton tells Clair that this Anubis guy is an unsafe lead and that he doesn't trust him, and Clair gets angry, brushing Trenton off. He tries to call multiple times, but Clair isn't listening. To make things worse, Clair ignores his warnings when his static-filled call finally gets through and goes to investigate the radioactive monolith.

critique: The answer should mention that Clair goes to investigate the monolith regardless.

critique: "leads to no response" should be "leads to no answer"

critique: The response should include that Clair and Trenton are partners.

critique: "Trenton tells Clair that this Anubis guy is an unsafe lead and that he doesn't trust him, and Clair gets angry, brushing Trenton off." - this is inaccurate. Trenton never told Clair that he doesn't trust Anubis.

critique: The response contains inaccurate information.

critique: The answer should mention her relationship with Trenton.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.


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critique: The answer should mention that they sell vintage Japanese fabrics by the yard and lot, country Japanese antique textiles, and handmade kimono accessories.


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JOHN ERICKSON (born January 5, 1964) is an American professional golfer who played the Canadian Tour from 1987 to 1994 and the PGA Tour of Australasia Tour from 1987 to 1992.

Competition

Erickson was a top national collegiate player at Fresno State - Sun Bowl All American, 1985 Big West Conference champion, NCAA All-American as well as a quarter finalist in the 1983 U.S. Amateur. As a pro, he won several events worldwide including the 1991 Windsor Charity Classic shooting a 17 under par tournament record score of 271 (68-67-67-69) on the Canadian Tour. He was one of the last players to win an international event using a persimmon driver. In 1991, Erickson was a Sony World ranked professional player.

In November 2008, after 15 years of retirement, Erickson made a return to professional competition and the winner's circle taking home a 7 stroke victory in the TRGA Las Vegas Classic played at Las Vegas National Golf Club which hosted the Las Vegas Invitational on the PGA Tour throughout the 1960s and 1970s. The event was unique in that it required players to use equipment no later than 1979. No metal woods, long putters, or wedges over 56 degrees were allowed. The event followed the rules and guidelines of the Traditional Rules of Golf (TRGA).

The Golfing Machine

Erickson was an early protégé of the controversial teaching method “The Golfing Machine” that was based upon the book of the same name written by Homer Kelley. The Golfing Machine drew from physics and geometry, breaking the golf swing down into 24 components, 4 power accumulators, 16 variations, and 4 imperatives. The objective nature of the teaching methodology differs from the past in that the teacher must remain objective and not inject a subjective or mysterious nature into instruction. “Complexity is far more simple and workable than mystery” quoted from “The Golfing Machine” (preface). Bobby Clampett, and Mac O'Grady were also having success using the Golfing Machine model around this time period.

Retirement

In 1993 Erickson retired from competition. Erickson has been quoted as being “a promoter of the traditional values of the game” and did not favor the direction the game was moving into longer courses, bigger greens wider fairways as well as radical equipment changes such as super large-headed titanium drivers and plastic golf balls. “Golf is a game played outside on a parkland where the course and the equipment should work in harmony. It should be required that the golfer to be tested across various aspects of the game including tee shots, short, mid and long irons particularly on the par 4’s as they were properly intended. Technology has been striving to remove the difficult long iron approach shot into the par fours of a championship golf course. Long iron approach shots should be the acid test of the game and the golf swing itself. A proper championship course with the traditional 10 par fours should require three or four long iron approach shots, along with the mid iron and short iron approaches”. As a golf purist, he believed woods should be made of wood or persimmon, strongly opposed perimeter weighted irons, and believed golf courses were sacred sites to celebrate and play the ancient game, not a vehicle to sell real estate home lots. Erickson believed golf should be a game of physical and mental skill, much like Chess where the rules for play are honored and respected. He believed the USGA did not stand up to the equipment makers, selling the game out for profit while forcing a new technology upon golf in the process losing its long-rooted traditional values. Erickson believed the world's classic old courses were not meant to be lengthened and in doing so, disgraced the design, shape, and intention of how the holes should be played. Erickson is outspoken about his support for famous golf architect Alister MacKenzie's ideals, who believed golf should be walked, and the game should be more about skill than the pursuit of technological advances in equipment.

Erickson lives in the San Francisco Bay Area and still plays golf with persimmon and blade style irons promoting the traditional values of the game.

Author

Erickson has been a consultant for the Traditional Rules of Golf Association (TRGA) and has been a contributing author and part of the TRGA brain trust.

Erickson is also working on a book about the golf swing.

title: John Erickson (golfer)

question: Describe what the text states about the Golfing Machine.

answer: The Golfing Machine is a style of traditional golf used by John Erickson. He was an early learner as a result of following the written method Homer Kelley. Golfing like chess involves thinking piece by piece, and the method works so far because it is more effective and accurate with the 24 components. The result is meant to be specialized and hence accurate.

critique: The answer describes the method inaccurately.

critique:
- The following sentence shouldn't be fragmented and be in the present tense: "The result is meant to be specialized".
- Incomplete word on the second sentence. Gaps are also missing.
- The machine shouldn't be compared to chess as there is no direct relationship between both.

critique: The text does not state that the Golfing Machine is a style of traditional golf used by John Erickson. He was an early learner as a result of following the written method Homer Kelley. Golfing like chess involves thinking piece by piece, and the method works so far because it is more effective and accurate with the 24 components. The result is meant to be specialized and hence accurate.

critique: The text doesn't say that golfing like chess is more effective and accurate.

critique: The 24 components are not meant to be specialized and hence accurate.

question: What are some of Erickson's belief about golf that the text describes once he retired?

answer: He believes golf should be a game of physical and mental skill.  He believes equipment like irons and drivers should also be made of wood or persimmon. He believes golf courses were sacred site to celebrate and play the ancient game.  He believes the USGA has sold the game out.

critique: The answer should mention his views on the game's direction.

critique: "He believes golf should be a game of physical and mental skill.  He believes equipment like irons and drivers should also be made of wood or persimmon. He believes golf courses were sacred site to celebrate and play the ancient game.  He believes the USGA has sold the game out." - this is incorrect. The article says he was a promoter of traditional values and that he was outspoken about his support for famous golf architect Alister MacKenzie's ideals.

critique: The answer should mention that he believes the game should be played in harmony with the course and equipment.

critique: Erickson wanted the game to be played with traditional equipment, but he didn't oppose all modern equipment.

critique: The answer omits the part of Erickson's beliefs that golf should not be lengthened.

critique: It would be more accurate to say that Erickson believes that golf courses are sacred sites to play the ancient game

question: What would Erikson think about mini golf courses that are present in today's culture?

answer: He's not a fan of them.

critique: The answer is too vague to answer the question.

critique: It is not stated that he is not a fan of them.

critique: The input does not mention mini golf courses

critique: The answer is not stated in the article.

critique: The answer is incorrect. Erickson is a golf purist and a supporter of the traditional values of the game. He would not be a fan of mini golf courses because they do not honor the traditional values of the game.


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MICHAEL PEZZULLO, is an Australian public servant. In October 2014, he was appointed the Secretary of the Department of Immigration and Border Protection. On 20 December 2017, a reshaping of departments led to him taking up the post of Secretary of the Department of Home Affairs.[1] Prior, Pezzullo had been the Chief Executive Officer of the Australian Customs and Border Protection Service.[2]

Education

Pezzullo has a Bachelor of Arts (with Honours) in History from the University of Sydney.[3]

Career

Pezzullo joined the Department of Defence as a graduate in 1987.[4] After five years in the Defence department, Pezzullo discovered “the experience, age and, to some extent, ideological and almost philosophical gap between [him] and the next level up meant [he] would not advance until [he] became crusty, old and cynical,”[5] so in 1992 he transferred to the Department of Prime Minister and Cabinet, where he worked in the International Division.

In 1993 Pezzullo joined the staff of the Minister for Foreign Affairs, Senator Gareth Evans, and remained in Parliament House until December 2001, including as deputy chief of staff to then opposition leader Kim Beazley.[6] In February 2002, he rejoined the Department of Defence and, in 2006, was promoted to the position of Deputy Secretary Strategy in that department.[7] Between February 2008 and May 2009 he led the Defence White Paper team and was principal author of the 2009 Defence White Paper.[8][9]

In July 2009 Pezzullo joined the Australian Customs and Border Protection Service as chief operating officer, a role which he continued in until September 2012. He was promoted to acting chief executive over the period September 2012 to February 2013 and on 15 February 2013 was employed as the substantive CEO.[10] When appointing Pezzullo, then Home Affairs Minister Jason Clare told media that Customs required major structural change, and Pezzullo had been appointed to drive reforms.[11] In the role, Pezzullo emphasised the importance of border security not only as a security issue, but also as an economic concern.[12]

On 2 October 2014 Prime Minister Tony Abbott announced that he had made Pezzullo the new Secretary of the Department of Immigration and Border Protection, effective 13 October 2014, replacing Martin Bowles.[13] As immigration secretary, Pezzullo led changes in his department recasting what had been seen as traditional immigration and border security institutions and doctrines.[14]

Management of conflict of interest

_The Sydney Morning Herald_ reported that early in 2014 Pezzullo's brother, Fabio, escaped a criminal conviction after he confessed to lying to an inquiry investigating corruption at Sydney airport.[15]

Fabio Pezzullo, a former Customs officer, was fined and placed on a two-year good behaviour bond for perjuring himself before a corruption watchdog. The 42-year-old was charged after an investigation over allegations he sold prescription drugs to fellow Sydney Airport Customs officers and lied to the Australian Commission for Law Enforcement Integrity. The commission was investigating several of his colleagues for drug importation and bribery. Despite being told verbally and in writing not to tell anyone of the summons, Fabio Pezzullo told his flatmate, a former Customs officer. Fabio Pezzullo's sentencing took place in June 2014.[16]

While the case was underway Michael Pezzullo was fulfilling senior executive roles in Customs and Border Protection, but had disclosed the conflict to his minister from the outset.[17] In a note to staff regarding the case he was reported to have said: “from the outset, I asked and expected to be treated as a detached family member with no official rights, interests or powers in the matter.” The communique also details the processes that were implemented to manage any real or perceived conflict of interest relating to the case.[18]

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title: Mike Pezzullo

question: Why did Mike Puzello disclose the conflict to his minister and release a note to the staff?

answer: The note was to be treated as a detached family member with no official rights, interests or powers in the matter.

critique: The note was not just to be treated as a detached family member.

text: At the moment the answer is incoherent since it refers to the note and not Pezzullo as 'a detached family member with no official rights, interests or powers in the matter.'

category: coherence


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CORONA SENIOR HIGH SCHOOL (CHS) is a California Distinguished School high school in the city of Corona, California, United States, a growing city in the Inland Empire of Southern California. CHS is one of eight high schools in the Corona-Norco Unified School District.

History

CHS was the first high school in the area, established in 1894 when high school students met in the upper floor of the Corona Grammar school located in what now is called Victoria Park. The first actual High School opened in 1907. It was built in the Classic Revival style with columns and many steps on the front, on the west side of Main Street between Grand Boulevard and Olive street. This campus remained a high school until 1923, when the number of students outgrew the available classroom space. The second Corona High School was constructed, in the Mediterranean Revival style, at 815 West Sixth Street. This campus was designed by G. Stanley Wilson, an exceptional architect from Riverside, California, who had also designed parts of the Mission Inn. This campus remained in use as a high school until December 1960, when once again, the number of students exceeded its capacity After the high school moved from its second campus, the campus became Corona's Civic Center and City Hall. The second high school building is now listed on the National Register of Historic Places.[1]

The high school was relocated to 1150 West Tenth Street during the 196061 school year to accommodate a rapidly growing number of students wishing to attend. There were no graduates in 1897.

Students

Corona High School has a diverse student population of more than 4,000 students including; 4.3% African American and 54.0% Hispanic or Latino. White students make up approximately 35.1% of the student population. As of 2005 it was reported that 45.1% of the students at Corona High School come from socioeconomically disadvantaged homes. Although nearly half the students come from disadvantaged families, they comprise one of the highest graduation levels in the state with 94.6%.

Assertive Discipline at Corona High School is a consistency-based approach to classroom and school discipline. It is designed to create a positive educational atmosphere and provide educators with skills and confidence necessary to effectively reduce discipline problems. Every classroom has a set of assertive discipline program charts posted in the room. Teachers discuss the rules and the positive and negative consequences of the program with their students. The practices and procedures for discipline, tardiness, and truancy are aimed at teaching responsibility and building positive self-esteem. Each student receives the teacher's discipline plan included as part of the course syllabus. Corona High School exhibits pride, high morale, order and discipline, and respect for individual rights and responsibilities. In the 20052006 school year there were a total of 337 suspensions and 20 expulsions at Corona High School, well below the District average.

Academics

Corona's course offerings reflect the diversity of the school community. Classes offered include career/technical classes, honors and advance placement, a four-year AVID program, English acquisition, sheltered classes in core subjects, visual and performing arts, and special education.

All students are offered a core academic curriculum which stresses academic excellence. Advanced Placement and honors courses are offered in Math, Science, Language Arts, Social Science, and Foreign Language. Educational programs are provided to enhance the educational opportunities for disadvantaged, ESL, and Special Education students.

[A mural of the high school's black panther mascot.] Students have the opportunity to enroll in advanced placement (AP) courses at Corona High School. Students who successfully pass an optional end-of-course exam generally receive college credit. Of the 302 Advanced Placement Exams taken in Music Theory, English Literature, French and Spanish Languages, Calculus, Sciences (such as Biology and Physics), and Social Sciences (such as European History and Psychology), 61% passed. The school district passing rate was 48.2%. The Riverside County, California state and national passing rates were 45.6%, 57.1%, and 59.6% respectively.

The instructional program at Corona High School is based on the state's Academic Content Standards. Higher-level thinking skills are emphasized at all grade levels for all students. Teachers use criterion-referenced tests, teacher-made tests, common benchmark assessments, portfolios, and observations to assess student performance. Planning days and minimum days enable teachers to appropriately plan the cooperative delivery of instruction in support of the core curriculum to all students.

Teachers are an important part of the leadership of Corona High School. The staff serves on grade-level and subject-department teams to plan curriculum and recommend solutions to problems. Staff members communicate and learn from each other, both formally and informally.

Students with special needs are served in a variety of ways. The Student Study Team (SST) is a site-based group that works to provide modifications of and accommodations to the general education program. Modifications or accommodations could be provided by support personnel, such as school counselors, nurses, or psychologists. Intensive modifications/accommodations may require special education services which include, but are not limited to, special education itinerant services (for example, speech and language, adaptive physical education, occupational therapy), and resource specialists or special day class programs.

Sports

Corona High School offers a full range of sports, many of which have participated in CIF playoffs, and/or have won CIF Divisional championships. Booster clubs have added significant strength to many of the sports and organizations.

Fall Sports: Football, Boys Water Polo, Boys Cross Country, Girls Cross Country, Girls Tennis, Girls Volleyball, Girls Pep Squad. Winter Sports: Boys Basketball, Girls Basketball, Girls Soccer, Boys Soccer, Girls Water Polo, Wrestling. Spring Sports: Baseball, Softball, Golf, Girls Swimming, Boys Swimming, Girls Track, Boys Track, Boys Tennis, Boys Lacrosse, Girls Lacrosse, Boys Volleyball.

Performing arts

Corona High also offers a performing arts program with dramas, musicals, five choirs, marching/pep band, jazz band, symphonic band and video production which used to run the only daily live news broadcast in the Corona-Norco Unified District.

Clubs on campus

Corona High School offers a broad range of clubs, societies, organizations and student interest groups which have continuously received District, Regional, Statewide, and in the case of History Day projects, National recognition. Clubs Have on campus supervisors. Clubs are to have elected officers in which the students will choose, to run meetings. A proposed budget, constitution, charter and approval from the Activities Director and Administration is required to start any club.

Notable alumni

-   Brendan Beck - professional baseball player, San Francisco Giants organization
-   Tristan Beck - professional baseball player, San Francisco Giants organization[2][3]
-   Erica Blasberg - golfer who played on the LPGA Tour
-   Scott Bloomquist - Hall of Fame dirt racer
-   Ken Calvert - Congressman, House of Representatives: 44th congressional district
-   Darrin Chiaverini - Former NFL receiver and current college coach
-   Ryan Chiaverini - Television personality}
-   Mike Darr - Former Major League baseball player, San Diego Padres
-   Heath Farwell - NFL linebacker and pro bowler
-   Brian Hildebrand - Former Division 1 quarterback, Oregon State Beavers
-   Jess Hill - Former Major League baseball player (1935–37), USC football coach (1951–56), USC athletic director (1957–72)
-   George Ingalls - Congressional Medal of Honor Recipient
-   Joe Kelly - Major League Baseball pitcher, LA Dodgers
-   Mr. Mixx (David P. Hobbs) - Hip hop DJ, producer, co-founder of 2 Live Crew
-   Jennifer Ruiz - Professional soccer player
-   Matt Spanos - Former USC lineman
-   Demetrius Wright - USC Trojans free safety

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title: Corona High School

question: Summarize everything relating to diversity.

answer: Corona High School has a diverse 6000 student population. Of the current school's students, 40% are White, 54% are Hispanic or Latino, 4.4% are African American, and the remaining 1.2% consist of mixed students or students of other ethnicities. As of 2005, 45.1% of the students in this school come from socioeconomically disadvantaged families.

critique: The answer should mention the course offerings.

question: What does the article say about extra-curriculars?

answer: Corona High School offers a full range of sports, many of which have participated in CIF playoffs, and/or have won CIF Divisional championships. The school also offers a performing arts program with dramas, musicals, five choirs, marching/pep band, jazz band, symphonic band, and video production. The school also offers a broad range of clubs, societies, organizations, and student interest groups.

critique: The response is missing the district, regional, statewide, and national recognition received by the school's clubs and societies.

question: What does the article say about the other seven high schools in the Corona-Norco Unified School District?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer can be interpreted various ways. The original phrasing, "what does the article say about the other seven high schools in the Corona-Norco Unified School District" gives the impression that the reader knows what other seven schools there are, and asks what they are.

critique: The answer should mention that the article does not mention the other seven high schools.

question: Summarize everything relating to the school's different locations.

answer: CHS was first established in 1894, when high school students met in the upper floor of the Corona Grammar school. The main campus was built in the Classic Revival style and remained as a high school from 1907 to 1923. The second campus was built in the Mediterranean Revival style and remained in use as a high school from 1923 to 1960. When the school moved the third time, it stayed on the same street and was again renovated to accommodate a growing number of students.

critique: The third location mentioned in the answer is irrelevant.

critique: The second campus was built in the Classic Revival style and remained in use as a high school from 1923 to 1960.


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A few years ago, a friend of mine had a bachelor party. I'd forgotten about it until about two weeks before it happened, so I'd entirely forgotten to save up. Luckily, I made enough money that I could afford to go on the trip, but I knew I'd have to be a bit frugal. Unfortunately, it was Vegas, and I have a generally addictive personality...
Well, lucky for me, we were staying in Reno, a little ways out of Vegas, so the hotel was pretty cheap. It at least allowed me to have a little fun gambling. We had a pretty good time the first few days. Hell, I actually ended up about $300 after the second day, of a five day trip. The third day was pretty relaxed... Mostly just relaxing by the pool, not much gambling... at that point I had about $400 to blow for the weekend, which was nice.

The fourth day, though... Fuck, the fourth day...
Started off like any other day in Vegas. We got up, hungover as hell, at about 8am (well, I got up, and woke the rest of the lazy amateurs up). Did a few lines of blow, pocketed the rest, and headed back out to Vegas. Well, they did. I decided I was gonna check out the Reno scene, if only to give my body a rest for a day. What a fucking mistake.

I started out in some little diner. Made smalltalk with the young waitress there. Part of me wanted to flirt with her, because, well, she was Reno-cute, but I still felt like death warmed-over. Hell, maybe I was flirting with her and didn't realize it, because she gave me her number, and after I told her I was just there for a few days, said she'd pick me up that night and we'd have a good time.

Now, don't get me wrong, I'm not an idiot...but I was out of town, and it seemed like a great idea in my booze/coke filled mind. So I barhopped the rest of the day, until about the time she was supposed to pick me up, when I went back to the hotel. I waited around the room, doing the last of the blow, drinking the last of the booze, until she finally called, said she was downstairs.

Hell, I was so jacked up I didn't give a damn what happened, but in that coked-up frenzy, I kinda wanted to get fucked. Went down, hopped in her beat up red Honda civic, and let her drive. Sober, I'd'a taken count of where we were going, but at this point all I could do was stare at the tits on that waitress, who's name I still didn't know. Couldn't tell you how long it was, but we ended up in some shitty neighborhood. Didn't strike me wrong at the time, because, well, I was distracted by a piece of ass, and a shitty neighborhood wasn't gonna get between me and getting my rocks off.

She pulls me out of the car, and leads me up to this little shotgun house. The porch light was busted, I remember that. I remember it, because it wasn't just burnt out, like every non-working light you've ever seen... It was actually busted. The lightbulb itself was broken. Don't know why that struck me, but for some reason it made me really uneasy. Still, I was drunk and coked up, and really wanted that waitress ass. I followed her in the place.

Now, I've been in some shitty places in my life, but this place was something different. Dirty shag carpet, barely illuminated by cheap red lightblubs clinking in their housing as the fan above them spun away, sweeping the rancid smoke of tobacco, and god knows what other substances being exhaled into the stale air of the small house. Still, I wanted to get some.

She pulled me back into a little bedroom, and threw me on the bed. Finally, after all this shit, I was gonna have this slut ride me for a few minutes until I got bored and pretended to cum, because, let's be honest, I was too coked up to blow. It was all an ego thing. Of course, my goddamn dreams didn't get too far, when a couple of shady motherfuckers jump out of the closet of the little damn room. Looking back at it, I can't believe I let that stupid little tramp play me like that, but, well, looking back at it, I'm sober.

Well, you wouldn't know it to look at me, but I come from a pretty shitty past, and this wasn't the first time I'd been jumped. It was pretty obvious these two wannabe gangster pricks played me for some out of town pussy, they took the time to try to make some big show of how they 'got me.' Well, I wasn't having any of that shit. Maybe it was the booze, maybe it was the blow, all I know is I blacked out.

A minute? An hour? At some point, I came to. Standing up, a pain in my chest, nose, my right hand. My blood was boiling, heart pounding out of my chest, dizzy as hell... Couldn't say how long I stood there, confused, before the world filled around me. It was the strangest experience. The shitty, lounge-lizard music waving through the place through some cheap, probably-stolen speakers, eased through the pulse in my ears. The crying. Fuck, the crying. That bitch that brought me here was crumpled up in a corner crying. Sensations perked back up in my limbs, mostly pain. I took in the situation.

The two guys. The two fucking guido pieces of shit that thought they'd have the best of me. They were on the floor. One of the bastards, I remember he was bald, had a fucking fedora on, he was closest to me. All I can really say about the guy was that he was bald. Don't really remember what he looked at before I blacked out, and... Well, he didn't have much of a face left when I came out of it. The faint smoke of a pistol, obviously shot faster than it was made to, escaped a barrel, next to his body. He was left, limp, on the ground, more blood than skin showing.

His friend was a little better off, if you can consider it as such. His left arm hung pretty limp next to him, as he crouched over the fedora fuck. His hand was on the bald prick's neck, he was screaming, "He's dead. He's fucking dead. You fucking killed him!" This big, strong guy was crying, and apparently it was my fault. I ditched.

I wasn't about to be charged with a damn crime I couldn't even remember. I ran the fuck out of there. I had no idea where I was, but I knew I needed to be out of there. My vest, my button-up, they went out to the side of the road. Looking back, I was still probably covered in blood. Especially considering my thumb was facing the wrong direction, my nose was pretty much flat, and I had a couple broken ribs. God knows how I ran with those ribs... Adrenaline's a helluva drug.

I'd say the adrenaline wore off after a while, because I ended up blacking out again. Woke up sometime the next morning, to the freaked-out screams of my delinquent friends... Must have looked worse than I remember. I told'em I didn't remember a thing, and decided to stay in the hotel 'til it was time for home.

I guess what I'm getting at is... I shot a man in Reno, just to watch him die.

title: Not sure if this is the right place for a true story, but here's the tale of my trip to Vegas...

question: What does the story say about the event in Reno?

answer: The narrator heads to Reno, hoping to escape his troubles for a little while (he isn't doing so well at home). He's kind of depressed about his situation and needs someone to help distract himself from it all (his friends are helpful too). At one point, he meets a female server and decides to hang out with her. They go to the woman's house, and the narrator encounters two men before passing out. When he wakes up, the men are both dead and the narrator escapes.

critique: It's omitted that the narrator doesn't remember anything.

critique: The narrator doesn't know the woman he meets is a prostitute because she tricks him into going to her house where she works.

critique: The narrator doesn't meet a female server.

critique: The narrator's friends are not helpful in distracting him.

critique: The last sentence is inaccurate. The narrator leaves the house and the two guys are injured.

critique: The narrator is not depressed about his situation.

critique: The answer could be more specific by mentioning the female server is actually a prostitute.

critique: The response misses to mention that the two men are criminals, who apparently mistook the narrator for someone else.

critique: The response incorrectly mentions that the narrator is depressed when he is in Reno.

critique: The last sentence is inaccurate. The narrator does not pass out.

critique: "He's kind of depressed about his situation and needs someone to help distract himself from it all (his friends are helpful too). At one point, he meets a female server and decides to hang out with her. They go to the woman's house, and the narrator encounters two men before passing out. When he wakes up, the men are both dead and the narrator escapes." - this is inaccurate because it is not stated that the narrator is depressed.

critique: The narrator doesn't pass out, he blacks out.

critique: The narrator was not in a believable place as mentioned in the story after dealer out his friends.

critique: It's omitted that the narrator's old friends are also in Reno for a celebration.

critique: The responses of the two men are not necessary.

question: What does the story say about the narrator's career?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should say that it is not stated in the story.

critique: There's nothing in the story about the narrator's career. Rewrite the response.

critique: There is no career mentioned in the story.

critique: Can't get into the details of his job, his addiction, or a lack of money to take a trip to Vegas with the gang but used to make enough money to take trips on his own and can't remember lending out any.

critique: No answer is given, however the narrator has a history of coming into conflict with gangsters.

critique: There's no information about the narrator's career.

critique: There is no answer because the narrator doesn't have an occupation.

critique: There is no information about the narrator's career.


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Iconic leadership trainer Dale Carnegie’s classic book, _How to Win Friends and Influence People_ turns 80 in 2017, but his timeless advice about getting the best out of people by bringing out the best in them is as on target in the digital age as ever before.

And while Carnegie couldn’t have foreseen the transformation of the workplace thanks to the Internet and the rise of remote work, the principles he taught in the four main sections of his book can help you make more meaningful, productive connections with your off-site team members. Read on for our translation of these four points into today’s business context:

PART 1: FUNDAMENTAL TECHNIQUES IN HANDLING PEOPLE

_“Any fool can criticize, complain, and condemn — and most fools do. But it takes character and self-control to be understanding and forgiving.” ~ Dale Carnegie_ [Tweet this]

So much of remote communication is done shorthand through quick messages and even one-letter texts. What gets lost in translation is tone and inference, so often something that isn’t meant to come off as dismissive or critical is interpreted that way by the person on the receiving end.

Before you shoot off your next chat message, email or text, take the time to craft thoughtful commentary that includes honest and sincere appreciation and gives credit when it’s due. It doesn’t have to be serious; upbeat emojis or an enthusiastic gif can say it all.

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If you have constructive notes to share, consider hopping on a video chat to discuss. Eye contact, nonverbal cues and a back and forth dialog can help eliminate misunderstandings and make it simpler to reach a productive resolution.

Also, be sure to consider the situation from the other person’s perspective – when you understand your team member’s motivations, you’ll actually have a better shot at convincing him/her that your desired outcome is also in his/her best interest.

If the tables are turned, and you receive a note or message that strikes you as “off,” you too can be understanding and give the other person the benefit of the doubt before you react.

PART 2: WAYS TO MAKE PEOPLE LIKE YOU

_“You can make more friends in two months by becoming interested in other people than you can in two years by trying to get other people interested in you.” ~ Dale Carnegie _

Without a water cooler to gather around or an easy way to go out for a drink after work, casually bonding with co-workers can be challenging for remote workers. That’s why taking time to virtually get to know your co-workers by asking questions about the things they care about beyond work (family, hobbies, other interests, etc.) is key. You should know who on the team is a dog person, who’s a big traveler, and who likes to chat about current events.

Also, don’t forget to hop on a video chat as often as possible, because nothing can take the place of face-to-face communication. Carnegie was a huge proponent of letting ’em see you smile – it’s a “messenger of your goodwill.”

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PART 3: HOW TO WIN PEOPLE TO YOUR WAY OF THINKING

_“You can dramatize your ideas in business or in any other aspect of your life. It’s easy.” ~ Dale Carnegie _

In this section, Carnegie focused on finding ways to bring others into your tent by being a good listener, acting respectfully, admitting mistakes and by avoiding disagreements. (“There is only one way under high heaven to get the best of an argument – and that is to avoid it.”)

Utilizing task management software and file sharing to its fullest potential is a great way to reinforce the exchange of ideas and virtual collaboration. And when you’re making a case for your point of view, get creative with your pitch and incorporate video or other eye-catching methods to follow Carnegie’s advice: dramatize your ideas to engage others’ imaginations and appeal to their concerns.

PART 4: HOW TO GET MORE OUT OF YOUR TEAM (IE: BE A LEADER)

_“Give the other person a fine reputation to live up to.” ~ Dale Carnegie _

In all communication, your words have the power to build people up… and tear them down. Carnegie reminds us to appeal to people’s “nobler motives,” and really take the time to be specific with praise, and encouraging when something needs to be corrected. Be sure to note milestones and important accomplishments on group chats and calendars, and celebrate individual and group successes. Aside from positive reinforcement being a cornerstone of Carnegie’s teachings, the benefits of this approach, including greater productivity, higher engagement, lower employee turnover and an overall happier, healthier team, are supported by copious research.

Carnegie was a master of human nature, and his advice for people who interact with others on a daily basis (hullo, all of us!), regardless of medium, holds up. For remote teams, his principles help make proximity less important, and productivity far more accessible.

question: What does the text say about Dale Carnegie's personal life?

answer: No answer

critique: The text does not mention anything about Dale Carnegie's personal life.

critique: The text doesn't say anything about Carnegie's personal life.

critique: The answer should mention that Carnegie's classic book How to Win Friends and Influence people was published in 1936.

critique: The text doesn't mention anything about Carnegie's personal life.

critique: The text does not mention anything about Carnegie's personal life.

question: What does the text say about the author's approach to handling people remotely based on Carnegie's methods?

answer: The author suggests making meaningful, productive connections by bringing out the best in people. They also suggest to give constructive notes, consider talking on a video chat, and ask about co-worker's interests beyond work. Carnegie also says to be a good listener, act respectfully, admit mistakes, and avoid disagreements. The author suggests to praise people, and celebrate individual and group successes.

critique: The answer should mention the author's approach to handling people remotely.

critique: The author also suggests that you consider the situation from the other person's perspective.

critique: The author's approach is not mentioned in the text.

critique: "The author suggests to praise people, and celebrate individual and group successes." - doesn't answer the question about the author's approach. Rewrite the sentence.

critique: The author's approach is not described in the text.

critique: There is one deviation from the sentence quoted as the content tip under PART 4. In the instruction, it says that giving people a fine reputation needs to be listed after being a good listener, act respectfully, admit mistakes, and avoid disagreements. This isn't implemented in the example.

question: How can remote workers bond when there is no live interaction?

answer: They can ask questions about the things their co-workers care about beyond work. They can also video chat as often as possible.

critique: The answer could also have mentioned that it's important that remote workers take the time to get to know their co-workers.

critique: The answer should mention that they can also bond over shared interests.

critique: The answer should mention that the co-workers can also bond over shared interests.

critique: The answer doesn't mention that the remote workers can bond over their shared interests.

critique: The article properly mentions the need for bonding to the remote workers through virtual face to face communication.

critique: The answer should mention that they can bond over their shared interests.

critique: The answer should mention that they can bond over shared interests.

critique: "They can ask questions about the things their co-workers care about beyond work. They can also video chat as often as possible." - redundant and should be deleted.

question: What does the text say about being a good leader?

answer: Being a good leader means being able to get the best out of people by bringing out the best in them. The text advises to give the other person a fine reputation to live up to and to appeal to people's nobler motives. It's important to be specific with praise and encouraging when something needs to be corrected. The text also advises to note milestones and important accomplishments on group chats and calendars and to celebrate individual and group successes.

critique: The final two lines are vague, instead of giving instruction

critique: The answer repeats information from the third and fourth sections of the text. These sections should be omitted.

critique: The answer could be clearer in its pronoun use.

critique: The answer should mention that the text is talking about remote teams.

critique: The answer should mention the benefits of being a good leader.

critique: The response is missing the part about giving credit when it's due.


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[Damage caused during the labour disruption]The 2008 TORONTO TRANSIT COMMISSION STRIKE was a legal strike action by Toronto Transit Commission (TTC) unionized employees that began on April 26, 2008, at 12:01 a.m. EDT.[1][2] All bus, streetcar and subway service in Toronto, Ontario, Canada, was suspended, leaving thousands of people stranded across the city.[3] Although the strike action was legal, the Amalgamated Transit Union (ATU) Local 113 did not provide 48-hour notice of the service withdrawal as they had previously promised they would do. Instead, the ATU only provided 90 minutes' notice before the service withdrawal.[4] Bob Kinnear, president of ATU Local 113, claimed that the lack of an advance notice was necessary to protect the TTC employees from “angry and irrational members of the public”.[5]

General synopsis

The strike occurred when the two unions, ATU Local 113 and Canadian Union of Public Employees Local 2, voted 65% to reject the offer made on April 20, 2008.[6] The result of the ratification vote was completed just after 10:00 p.m. on April 25 and Torontonians and TTC employees were given approximately 90 minutes' notice before the job action began.

The rejected offer had offered TTC operators a 3% wage increase each year for three years. Some operators and maintenance staff were not pleased with the offer. There were also concerns over the injury compensation package and, according to some reports, contracting out work.[7] TTC employees voiced their concerns over the week prior to the strike.

Back-to-work legislation

[Ontario premier Dalton McGuinty] At approximately 11:45 p.m. on April 25, minutes before the strike began, Toronto mayor David Miller held a news conference stating that the strike action was “unacceptable and irresponsible” after the ATU failed to comply with the initial 48-hour strike notice and the subsequent rejection of the contract.[8][9] The mayor made a special request to Ontario premier Dalton McGuinty asking him to seek back-to-work legislation, a special law that would block the TTC strike from continuing.[10] By 12:30 p.m. on April 26, the provincial government had signed an Order in Council allowing for a rare Sunday sitting of the Ontario legislature to consider a bill (Bill 66) to order the union and its members back to work.[11]

On April 27, 2008, Bill 66 was unanimously passed by the Ontario Legislature, a process which only took 30 minutes. The law was quickly given royal assent by David Onley, the Lieutenant Governor of Ontario, and it came into force at 2 p.m. The TTC was given a few hours to ensure the system was ready to operate and to build up service. Most transit service resumed by that evening.[12]

Offer

-   Term: three years, expiring March 31, 2011
-   Wages: April 1, 2008 – 3%; April 1, 2009 – 3%; April 1, 2010 – 3%
-   Vision Care: $300 every 2 years; plus $50 for exams
-   Dental Care: major restorative, including implants up to $2,500
-   Orthodontic: up to $4,000 (50% TTC coverage)
-   Physio & Chiro: $1,000 max ($35 per visit)
-   Long-term Disability: $2,550 max, per month

Source: TTC[13]

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title: 2008 Toronto Transit Commission strike

question: What does the text say is the cause of the Toronto Transit Commission strike of April 2008?

answer: TTC employees were unhappy and required more in regards to wages and benefits than what was offered by the transit authority. The negotiations also had trouble regarding contracting out for certain bus and train operators.

critique: It is omitted that the negotiations also had trouble regarding injury compensation.

critique: The TTC employees were unhappy about the contract that was offered by the TTC, not the transit authority.

critique: This answer is not fully accurate because the cause of the strike is not stated in the article.

critique: "TTC employees were unhappy and required more in regards to wages and benefits than what was offered by the transit authority. The negotiations also had trouble regarding contracting out for certain bus and train operators." - this is incorrect. There were no negotiations and the transit authority had already made an offer.

critique: The answer states the drivers weren't happy with the offer, which isn't accurate.

critique: The answer should mention that the negotiations were between the Amalgamated Transit Union and the Canadian Union of Public Employees.

critique: The negotiation process could be more in-depth and cover the specific issues that were a point of contention.

critique: The answer should mention the lack of notice.

critique: The amount companies contracted out is not worthy to be mentioned in the reason behind a strike.

critique: "The negotiations also had trouble regarding contracting out for certain bus and train operators" is not relevant to the question.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The text does not state that the negotiations had trouble regarding contracting out for certain bus and train operators.

critique: The issue of contracting out employees was not just an issue of whether they would be allowed to contract out, but also a concern over the injury compensation package.

critique: The answer is not clear about the cause of the strike.


text:
EdTech & Design
Makerspaces engage students to learn in and out of school...

[Facts on Ed Makerspaces]

Makerspaces are informal community or in-school learning spaces that offer tools and resources for community members and students to tinker with a mix of traditional technologies – such as cardboard, wood, recycled plastic, or fabric – and more cutting-edge technologies – such as 3D printers and scanners, robotics, laser cutters, open-source computers, microcontrollers, and sensors. Makerspaces can be found in community centres, libraries, schools, and other public spaces, including pop-up Makerspaces setup for single day events and mobile Makerspaces that reach remote populations. While definitions vary, there were an estimated 1,400 Makerspaces worldwide in 2016: 14 times as many as there were in 2006.

Makerspaces engage students to learn in and out of school, by providing opportunities to:

-   DEVELOP 21ST CENTURY EMPLOYMENT SKILLS through solving problems and thinking creatively.
-   LEARN THROUGH PLAY AT THEIR OWN PACE BY DEVELOPING SELF-CONFIDENCE through designing objects and creating them with 3D printers or through programming a robot.
-   DEEPEN WHAT IS LEARNED IN SCIENCE, TECHNOLOGY, ENGINEERING, ART AND MATHEMATICS (STEAM) CLASSES, by making connections with real-life tasks and problems. Makerspaces are especially useful for engaging students who have not thrived in a traditional school setting, since these subjects are often taught in separate classes without practical applications.
-   EXPLORE THEIR INTERESTS AND DEVELOP CREATIVE SOLUTIONS TO REAL-WORLD PROBLEMS, showing that solving complex social issues often requires multiple skills and people.
-   DEVELOP INTERGENERATIONAL RELATIONSHIPS AND BUILD COMMUNITIES through activities that draw from community expertise and build shared goals with community members. This allows knowledge and skills to be shared and personal connections to be created between people of all ages, including strengthening teacher-student relationships.
-   DEVELOP COLLABORATION SKILLS AND TEACH OTHERS WHAT THEY LEARN, so that children understand that they can take on a variety of roles, such as being a leader, a builder, an organizer, a planner, a technician, an engineer or a designer.
-   DEVELOP FINE MOTOR SKILLS through using manual tools. This includes connecting circuits, assembling small parts together, and cutting, gluing, polishing or sanding objects.
-   LEARN BY TRIAL AND ERROR, take risks, and persevere in challenging situations where they feel supported in “getting their hands dirty.”

Evidence suggests that Makerspaces help develop practical skills that increase student engagement and prepare children for the 21st century job market. Whether repairing an old radio, knitting with embedded wearables, or building a robot, Makerspaces allow students to explore their interests, develop their passions, and thrive in the classroom and beyond.

ADDITIONAL INFORMATION RESOURCES

Davidson, A.-L. (2017). You too can experience the “maker scream. Concordia University. Retrieved from www.concordia.ca/cunews/main/stories/2017/05/03/maker-scream-education-professor-saltise-winner-ann-louise-davidson.html

Davidson, A.-L. (2017). On Focus. Retrieved from www.linkedin.com/pulse/focus-ann-louise-davidson/

Davidson, A.-L. (2017). This Easter, Conquer the Impossible with Your Kids. Retrieved from www.linkedin.com/pulse/easter-conquer-impossible-your-kids-ann-louise-davidson/

REFERENCES

Andersson, P. (2015). _Digital fabrication and open concepts: An emergent paradigm of consumer electronics production_. (Bachelor thesis, Umeå University). Retrieved from www.diva-portal.org/smash/get/diva2:822484/FULLTEXT0

Davidson, A.-L., Price, D. (2018). Does Your School Have the Maker Fever? An Experiential Learning Approach to Developing Maker Competencies. _Learning Landscapes_, 11(1), 103-120. Retrieved from www.learninglandscapes.ca/index.php/learnland/article/view/926/918

Lou, N., & Peek, K. (2016). “By The Numbers: The Rise of the Makerspace.” _Popular Science_. Retrieved from www.popsci.com/rise-makerspace-by-numbers

Fleming, L. (2015). _World of making: Best practices for establishing a makerspace for your school._ Thousand Oaks, CA: Corwin.

Peppler, K., Halverson, E., & Kafai, Y. (Eds.). (2016). _Makeology: Makerspaces as learning environments_(Volume 1). New York, NY: Routledge.

Peppler, K., Halverson, E., & Kafai, Y. (Eds.). (2016). _Makeology: Makers as learners_ (Volume 2). New York, NY: Routledge.

Sheridan, K., Halverson, E. R., Litts, B., Brahms, L., Jacobs-Priebe, L., & Owens, T. (2014). Learning in the making: A comparative case study of three makerspaces. _Harvard Educational Review,_ 84, 505–531.

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[ANN-LOUISE DAVIDSON EDCAN NETWORK]

Dr. Ann-Louise Davidson

Associate Professor of Education at Concordia University

Ann-Louise Davidson (PhD) is an Associate Professor of Education at Concordia University, and holds a Concordia University Research Chair in Maker Culture. She is Associate Director of the Milieu...

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question: What kinds of students might benefit from being part of Makerspaces?

answer: Students who have not thrived in a traditional school setting.

critique: "Students who have not thrived in a traditional school setting." - is too general. Add the specific subjects that are taught in separate classes without practical applications.