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[COLÉGIO SANTO ANTÔNIO entrance (at reforms) at _Pernambuco street_, in Belo Horizonte.] COLÉGIO SANTO ANTÔNIO (ST. ANTHONY SCHOOL) is a Brazilian Franciscan school located in the Savassi neighborhood of Belo Horizonte, Minas Gerais. It is maintained by _Casa de Santo Antonio_ (St. Anthony House).[1]

History

Colégio Santo Antônio was established at São João del Rei, Minas Gerais, on May 1, 1909, by the Order of Friars Minor.[2] It distinguished itself as a benchmark of education, welcoming students from all over the country.

In the late 1940s, the school was moved to Belo Horizonte, the state capital, to better prepare students for the Federal University of Minas Gerais, then known as the University of Minas Gerais.

Under the direction of Brother Bertrando, Pedro Schretlen and others, the school was moved to 880 Pernambuco Street on February 17, 1950, where an inaugural mass was celebrated in a makeshift chapel. The school also began to support the autonomy of the new Franciscan province. That same year, the school added seven science classes, and offered its first gym classes two years later.

In 1972, the unit of São João del Rei (High School San Antonio) ceased operations, making the building available for other public projects. In the old building, the Municipal Foundation of São João del Rei was started, which was one of the entities forming the Federal University of São João del-Rei. The Franciscans kept the school true to the principles of the order. After the death of Brother Bertrando, the school went under the direction of Frei Felix, from 1959 to 1962. From 1962 to 1967, Frei Humbertino Backes, Eduardo Copray and Giraldi oversaw school operations. Frei Aristides Kasbergen managed the school from 1967 to 1984, Fr Dario Campos from 1984 to 1991, and Hilário Meekes from 1991 to 2000.

In 2002 and 2003, Zé Roberto and Pedro discontinued their leadership of the school, and Frei Flávio Silva Vieira continued the work in the area of pastoral care. Frei Jonas Nogueira da Costa took over the ministry in late 2006. Frei Jacir de Freitas Faria has been Director General and Pedagogical since late 2006. Since late 2007, Frei Alexsandro Rufino da Silva has been the Director of Administration and Finance.

In 2018 the educational institution became a member of the UNESCO Associated Schools Program Network (PEA / Unesco).[3][4]

Chronology

[Banner celebrating the school's centenary.]

-   1909 - Foundation of the school at São João del-Rei
-   1950 - Inauguration of the headquarters in Belo Horizonte, initially focused on science
-   1964 - Inauguration of the Shrine of St. Anthony
-   1977 - Installation of _Coleginho_ (little school) for early elementary school education
-   1992 - Implementation of the teaching of informatics
-   1999 - Implementation of an educational gratuity project to serve disadvantaged students

Characteristics

[_Coleginho_.] Colégio Santo Antônio (CSA) is maintained by the Association of Franciscan Education and Welfare. It belongs to the _Province of Santa Cruz_, internal division of the Order of the Friars Minor, founded in 1209 by St. Francis of Assisi.

The directors of the school are Frei Jacir de Freitas Faria (Educational and General), Fr Alexsandro Rufino da Silva (Administrative and Financial) and Frei Jonas Nogueira da Costa (Pastoral). On May 1, 2009, the school had been in operation for 100 years.

A series of extra-curricular activities in sports and the arts are offered by the school. Students take classes in guitar, violin, flute, ballet, jazz, folk dancing, soccer, handball, volleyball, and basketball. The school also has three choirs and an experimental orchestra.

The school won fourth place in Brazil in the High School Nacional Exam (_ENEM_) 2008.[5]

Campuses

The school has a primary education facility (_Coleginho_), located at Rua Pernambuco, 732 (Funcionários neighborhood). Here students study from 1st through 5th grade.

A combined middle school and high school is located at Rua Pernambuco, 880 (Savassi neighborhood). Here students study the 6th through 9th grade before advancing to the high school.

Student Council

The St. Anthony's Student Council is very active and is supported by the principals and teachers. During election periods, the Council organises awareness-raising campaigns for students, promoting debates between candidates for elective office and inviting judges of the Regional Electoral Court (_Tribunal Regional Eleitoral de Minas Gerais_) to give lectures.

In the cultural sector, the Council and its Department of Internal Affairs develop projects such as “Debate Theatre” and “Reading the Classics”. The Council also promotes the Festival of Bands at recess time. Students vote for the best bands and the winners get to play in the “Ice Cream Festival”, which is also sponsored by the Council.

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[2] About Colégio Santo Antônio. Retrieved October 21, 2019.

[3] Colégio Santo Antônio recebe selo da Unesco, _Estado de Minas_. Retrieved October 21, 2019.

[4] Apenas 19 escolas de Minas promovem valores da Unesco, _O Tempo_. Retrieved October 21, 2019.

[5] Ranking das 20 melhores escolas no ENEM 2008. _Mundo Vestibular_. Retrieved November 29, 2019.

title: Colégio Santo Antônio

question: Summarize the history of Colégio Santo Antônio.

answer: Colégio Santo Antônio was established in 1909 by the Order of Friars Minor. It was moved to Belo Horizonte in the late 1940s. In 1972, the unit of São João del Rei ceased operations. In 2018, the school became a member of the UNESCO Associated Schools Program Network.

critique: The school's move to Belo Horizonte is not relevant to the question.

critique: The answer omits the other moves of the school.

critique: The school's history is not limited to the 1940s and the 1970s.

critique: The school's history is not limited to the 1940s and 1972.

critique: SAJO's remaining in operation does not warrant mention separate from the other facts listed.

critique: The school's membership to the UNESCO Associated Schools Program Network was in 2018

question: Summarize a typical student's education at Colégio Santo Antônio.

answer: A typical student's education at Colégio Santo Antônio would begin at their primary education facility, Coleginho, located at Rua Pernambuco, 732. The students would study from 1st through 5th grade. After that they would advance to the combined middle school and high school, located at Rua Pernambuco, 880. The students would study the 6th through 9th grade before advancing to the high school.

critique: It is omitted that the school offers a series of extra-curricular activities in sports and the arts.

critique: The answer omits the extra-curricular activities.

critique: Nothing about extra-curricular activities is included here either.

critique: The answer is not a summary of the typical student's education at Colégio Santo Antônio. It is a summary of the school's history and campuses.

critique: The answer should mention the extra-curricular activities.

critique: It is omitted that they also offer extra-curricular activities in sports and the arts.

question: What does the text say about Colégio Santo Antônio's Student Council?

answer: The Student Council is a group of students elected by their peers. The council's goal is to help the school organize events. They have three types of council, each for elementary, middle, and high school students. The Student Council organizes awareness-raising campaigns that promote public debates between candidates for the high-school council, and invites high school presidents for the Region about to give juries.

critique: The third sentence is not stated in the text and should be omitted.

critique: The Student Council is not divided into three types.

critique: The Student Council is not divided into three groups.

critique: There's no mention that council helps organize events. The sentence is misleading.

critique: The Student Council is not a group of students elected by their peers.

question: Summarize the effect the Order of Friars Minor has had on Colégio Santo Antônio.

answer: The Order of Friars Minor founded the school and still supports it, as it belongs to the Order. The school's name is a reference to Saint Anthony, a Franciscan who is one of their patrons. The school keeps their Franciscan principles true and was able to add seven science classes and offer gym classes. It followed the Order's instructions by ceasing operations of the unit of São João del Rei, which made the building available for public projects.

critique: Near the end, there are extraneous details.

critique: The school's name is not a reference to Saint Anthony.

critique: "It followed the Order's instructions by ceasing operations of the unit of São João del Rei, which made the building available for public projects." - this is incorrect. The school ceased operations of the unit of São João del Rei in 1972, and the building was used for other public projects.

critique: "The Order of Friars Minor founded the school and still supports it, as it belongs to the Order." - this is incorrect. The Order of Friars Minor founded the school, but it no longer supports it.

critique: The last two sentences are irrelevant to the question.


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Getting outside may not only change your perspective — it could actually alter the way your brain works in some unexpected ways, according to a small new study.

“Your brain seems like it has to work harder and it’s less effective when it’s outside,” explains Kyle Mathewson, an assistant professor of psychology at the University of Alberta in Canada and the lead author of new research published in the journal_Brain Research._

For the study, Mathewson, along with graduate student Joanna Scanlon, monitored the brain activity of 12 people as they listened to a series of tones. Everyone was directed to press a button when they heard one of two sounds. This task was administered twice: first while sitting still inside a dim, quiet lab, then while riding a bike outside along a street. The goal was to see how the brain functions in the two environments, and if it’s changed by an everyday outdoor activity, like bike riding.

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They found, somewhat surprisingly, that while people were outside, their brains weren’t responding as robustly to the task at hand, perhaps because their attention was taxed by competing stimuli. A type of brain wave seen when the mind is at rest or meditating, which is commonly observed in the lab, all but disappeared in fresh air, Mathewson says.

Outside, “there are traffic sounds, and the sights of traffic, and all these people around you, and trees and birds and the wind and the cold,” Mathewson says_. “_All these extra sensations are kind of competing with the task that you’re doing,” forcing the brain to work harder to achieve the same result.

Bike riding, however, did not seem to make much of a difference on brain activity. While the indoor group was sedentary in this study, in one of Mathewson’s prior experiments, people rode a stationary bike indoors. Brain activity while biking inside did not differ much from when people sat quietly indoors, he says. The effects aren’t simply due to fresh air, either. When the researchers conducted a follow-up experiment, during which they played a recording of traffic sounds in a lab environment, they also observed reduced brain activity.

More research is needed. It’s too soon to tell whether these brain changes are positive or negative, and Mathewson says the results may not hold true for every outdoor environment. A tranquil meadow, for example, may not stress the brain in the same way as a busy urban street. Past research, in fact, has shown a host of mental health benefits associated with spending time in nature. “Going outside in this case might have appeared bad because we went outside beside busy traffic,” he says, “but if we went outside into nature, we might have found different effects.”

Since people in the study were still able to complete the test outdoors, despite their diminished cognitive response, the researchers are also repeating the experiment using progressively more difficult tasks, Mathewson says. “We think this task was too easy and that we weren’t able to tap into the effect,” he says. “Now we’re going to try to push a little bit harder and get more and more difficult tasks to see where the brain breaks down.”

The good news is that recent breakthroughs in technology — the creation of small, portable brain monitoring equipment that can be brought outside and on the go — not only made this study possible, but will continue to improve follow-up studies, Mathewson says. “This is going to open up a whole new field of studying people in their natural habitat,” he says.

WRITE TO Jamie Ducharme at jamie.ducharme@time.com.

question: Summarize the limitations of the study.

answer: In general, the study was based on a limited sample size. Another limitation is that the researchers used brain monitoring equipment that was too bulky for use in the field. The researchers plan to address these issues in future studies.

critique: It is not stated that the brain monitoring equipment was too bulky for use in the field.

critique: The first sentence is false. The study was based on a large sample size.

critique: The answer should mention that the study was conducted in a lab.

critique: The equipment isn't bulky, it's just not portable.

critique: The first sentence is irrelevant to the question.

critique: None of this directly relates to the limitations of the study.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The study was not based on a limited sample size.

question: Summarize the key findings of the study.

answer: The brain activity of 12 people was monitored as they listened to a series of tones. Everyone was directed to press a button when they heard one of two sounds. This task was administered twice: first while sitting still inside a dim, quiet lab, then while riding a bike outside along a street. The researchers found that while people were outside, their brains weren't responding as robustly to the task at hand. Outside, there are traffic sounds, sights of traffic, people, trees, birds, the wind, and the cold. All these extra sensations are competing with the task that you're doing, forcing the brain to work harder to achieve the same result.

critique: The answer should mention that the brain activity in the outdoor setting was less effective than that in the indoor lab.

critique: The answer should mention that the researchers found that bike riding didn't make much of a difference on brain activity.

critique: The answer should mention that the brain activity of the people outside was less robust.

critique: The brain activity was measured only during subject's listening to tones, not during all tasks.

question: What does the article say about the effects of weather on brain activity?

answer: No answer

critique: The article does not mention the effects of weather on brain activity.

critique: The answer should mention that the article does not mention anything about the effects of weather on brain activity.

critique: The article does not mention anything about the effects of weather on brain activity.

question: What does the article have to say about future studies?

answer: With the advancement of technology, there are now small, portable brain monitoring equipment. This technology has made this study possible, and will make further studies possible.

critique: The answer should mention the specific equipment.

critique: The answer should mention the specific equipment mentioned in the article.

critique: Include that with the advancement of this technology, further studies will become easier, and new ones will be able to explore the brain's natural habitat.

critique: The answer should mention that the author believes the study will open up a whole new field of studying people in their natural habitat.

critique: The answer should mention the future studies.

critique: The answer should mention what the future studies will be.

critique: The article doesn't say anything about future studies.

critique: The answer should mention that the study is ongoing.


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Ever wondered why René Magritte’s painting “The Son of Man” was like that? Here my take on how the painting came to be.

Once upon a time, before a performance, famous actor Charlie Chaplin got hungry and ate an apple. He was so hungry; in fact, that he forgot about the apple’s core and accidentally ate the whole thing without thinking. It was too late when he noticed this, so he just said “Aw, whatever,” and never thought about it again.

The years passed by. Charlie Chaplin continued to do what he loves best and that is to act. However, during that time, a strange occurrence happened. He began to feel something grow in his face. It worried him greatly yet did not do anything about it. But then one day, he saw it. He was looking at himself in front of a mirror and saw that a plant, a branch was growing straight from his face. He was greatly surprised and then he realized that is was from the apple he ate so many years ago. The seeds he ate somehow got stuck and grew from his face.

Charlie Chaplin was terrified. He didn’t even try to show it to any other person. So, suddenly, he shut himself from people, from the world. Of course, the world couldn’t let this matter go. They searched for him, to know why he disappeared. But they couldn’t find him. Charlie Chaplin was simply gone. More years passed and eventually, people let go.

Save for one man. A man, for reasons, shall not be named. This man, a painter, spent years finding Charlie. He never gave up, even when others did. On the other hand, Charlie Chaplin himself went into hiding whilst the plant continued to grow on his face. It grew too much that a fruit, an apple sprouted from its branches. The fruit covered his face. He couldn’t see anymore, he was blinded.

Thus, it was that fateful day that Charlie Chaplin roamed the streets, blind, not knowing where to go, with an apple on his face. The painter passed by and noticed the apple-faced man. The painter’s eyes opened wide for he knew this man. The man he was searching for all these years. This man was Charlie Chaplin.

The painter went closer to Charlie, who stood just there, motionless, apple-faced. So, he had a burst of emotion and just brought out his materials and painted him. When he was done, curiosity got the better of him and his hand was bought to Charlie’s face and he picked the apple straight from Charlie’s face.

But, there was no face. Charlie’s face was blank. The painter looked at the fruit in his hand and there it was: Charlie’s face was in the apple. The painter looked to where Charlie was and saw he was gone.

Sometime later, the painter found himself in a dark forest. It was nighttime and all he had was his flashlight. Suddenly, he got this feeling someone was following him. He ran and ran but it was to no avail. The follower caught up to him.

The painter looked back and saw a tall suited man. The most remarkable about this man was that he had no face. Then it hit the painter. Charlie Chaplin. Slenderman. Before a single word escaped his lips, Slenderman was in front of the painter.

“Wait! Before you kill me,” the painter says. “Let me eat this apple first.”

And so, the painter took the apple from his pocket. The same apple that he picked from Charlie Chaplin’s face years ago. He put it to his lips and took a single bite.

But it was not an apple.

The fruit he bit into was a tomato.

title: [MS] The Son of Man

question: What does the story say about the painter?

answer: The painter is a man searching for Charlie for years. He never gives up, even when other people do. He finds Charlie and paints a picture of him. Later, he picks an apple from Charlie's face and eats it. However, it was not an apple but a tomato. It is implied that the painter was killed by slenderman.

critique: The painter was not killed by slenderman.

question: What does the story say about itself being a silly one?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention the tomato at the end.


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[HM] **My Place Among The Nerds**
Nerd: an intelligent but single-minded person obsessed with a nonsocial hobby or pursuit
	My place among the nerds was and has never really been defined; I’ve just always felt that I was one. It probably stemmed from the weird person I was in middle school who nobody really knew because I was shy, awkward, and didn’t have anyone who understood me. Now I realize that that was all of us, but of course no one told me until now. I never knew where my place was just that my attributes were smart, shy, funny, temperamental at times, loved everything comic books, and, most importantly, has a strong love for music. Music has always been a way for me to realize that I’m never alone because if I can relate my life to a song then someone else has been where I am. It only made sense to learn how to play an instrument and to make my own music.
Place #1: Band Geeks
	I’ve always loved that term. Band Geek. It just rolls off the tongue right? It was also a title and a group of people who felt like I did and wanted to belong somewhere. What most people don’t know is that even though band is a clique of it’s own, there are different sections within a band which you choose to join from day one. It begins with three words: Woodwind, Brass, or Percussion? This loosely translates into: Would you like to play an instrument that you have to constantly sink money into for reeds and repairs, one where you feel like your lips will fall off after playing, or do you have anger management problems/ADD and want to hit stuff? I first chose Brass, realized I couldn’t really play the trumpet AT ALL, and went back to choose Woodwinds. The next choice was: Which one? Clarinet was the definite answer because it was small, looked easy to play and fun. It’s one of the best choices I’ve ever made in my entire life because the clarinet section consisted of the coolest people I had ever met. We were the talented, smart, funny, socially awkward people that eventually become the awesomest people in high school. That was my home until I came out of my shell and met the greatest influence on my middle school carrier, Mrs. Gilchrist.
Place #2: Thespians
	Mrs. Gilchrist was the reason I joined the fall play. She was the new Drama/Choir teacher that year and she made middle school bearable for me. She also pushed me to do things that she knew I would love, but hadn’t had the guts to do yet because I was shy, like acting and singing in front of a crowd. I had the smallest part in the whole play, an old woman who ran a hotel with her two sisters, but she hadn’t prepared me for the shocker I found in the script.
	That’s right. Not only was I going to make my acting debut, I had to sing a song and make up the tune for it too. I was terrified! I had NEVER sung or acted for anyone, especially the whole school and their families. How did we know if I even COULD sing?
	Opening night finally came, my nerves were all over the place and my singing scene was coming up. I walked across the stage, sat down and right on cue sang the lullaby of my own creation. It was perfect and the crowd clapped and cheered for me, a new rush I had never experienced before that filled me up with adrenaline and happiness. I had caught the Thespian bug and could never go back. I had become an acting junkie who’s inner nerd desperately wanted people to see her for the loud, funny person she was. After that, everything was a whirl of acting, memorizing, changing lines, rehearsing, singing and getting that ultimate prize of the thrill of applause, the high of being complimented, and the feeling of being noticed. Finally noticed.
Place #3: Choir Freak
Mrs. Gilchrist was convinced that now that I had sung in front of everyone, I had to keep doing it because I was actually really good at it. This led to my enrollment into choir. I was singing songs that I loved and had fun singing. All of my clarinet friends came along with me and had a great time discovering new places for their personal nerd needs. Our choir sang everything and everywhere that would take us because we wanted nothing more than to just sing, sing and sing some more. It fulfilled the musical nerd in me who had loved to sing since I was a little girl busting out Britney Spears at the grocery store. It was everything I had ever wanted, but there were a couple more parts of me that still weren’t being expressed.
To Be Continued.....

title: My Place Among The Nerds

question: Summarize the first community the narrator joins.

answer: The first community the narrator is a part of is the band geeks which are a nonexistent unification of geeky people devoted to playing instruments. There are brass, woodwind, and percussion sections, the narrator's choice. The narrator plays the clarinet. This section of the narrator's school band contains the coolest children who would later be the coolest in their high school. The narrator deeply values this community as it was full of people like them, who shared similar passions and favored qualities.

critique: The narrator didn't say that the band geeks were a nonexistent unification of geeky people.

critique: The narrator's section of the school band is not mentioned.

critique: The narrator's choice of instrument is irrelevant.

critique: The narrator's band is not a nonexistent unification of geeky people devoted to playing instruments.

critique: The narrator's choice of instrument is irrelevant to the question.

critique: It is not stated that the narrator deeply values the community as it was full of people like them, who shared similar passions and favored qualities.

critique: The first sentence is inaccurate and doesn't make much sense

critique: The first community the narrator is a part of is the band geeks which are a nonexistent unification of geeky people devoted to playing instruments. There are brass, woodwind, and percussion sections, the narrator's choice. The narrator plays the clarinet. This section of the narrator's school band contains the coolest children who would later be the coolest in their high school. The narrator deeply values this community as it was full of people like them, who shared similar passions and favored qualities.

critique: There's no information about "the band geeks who are a nonexistent unification" or that the narrator joins a band.

critique: The band geek community is not described as nonexistent.

critique: "reeds and repairs, one where you feel like your lips will fall off after playing, or do you have anger management problems/ADD and want to hit stuff?" is evidence that the narrator was aware of the choices available. Include this in the response as well.

question: What role does Mrs. Gilchrist have in the main character's life?

answer: She is the one who suggests the main character looks into joining band, which turns into the main character assimilating with the band geeks. She also suggests that the main character should be in the school play and gives her the part of an old woman with her two sisters. Mrs. Gilchrist helps the main character be outgoing, feel noticed, and comfortable in casting herself as a loud and funny person. Mrs. Gilchrist sees a "nerd" in the main character and finds qualities better than those that the nerd sees in themselves.

critique: "She also suggests that the main character should be in the school play and gives her the part of an old woman with her two sisters." - this is incorrect. The main character was already in the school play.

critique: This is too long, and the first sentence is inaccurate.

critique: This is a lot of information that is not relevant to the question.

critique: This response does not fit the question. A new sentence should be written.

critique: The answer is too long and should be rewritten.

critique: 'She also suggests that the main character should be in the school play and gives her the part of an old woman with her two sisters.' must change to reflect that Mrs. Gilchrist suggested she joins the drama/choir club

critique: It is not stated that Mrs. Gilchrist leads the main character to assimilate with other nerds.

critique: "She also suggests that the main character should be in the school play and gives her the part of an old woman with her two sisters." - this is inaccurate. The main character was already in the school play.

critique: The band geeks are not the nerd's natural tendency and should be omitted.

critique: The passage does not say that Mrs. Gilchrist sees a nerd in the main character.

critique: The last sentence is not relevant to the question.

critique: The response doesn't list all the ways in which Mrs. Gilchrist influences the main character.

critique: "She also suggests that the main character should be in the school play and gives her the part of an old woman with her two sisters." - is inaccurate. Mrs. Gilchrist is the reason why the narrator joined the fall play.

critique: This sentence reads awkwardly and is overall wordy.

text: This summary is full of inaccuracies. Mrs Gilchrist has nothing to do with the main character joining the band. She pushes the girl to do things that she knows she will love which is why she encourages her to act. She later gets her to join the chior.

category: accuracy

refinement: She is the one who suggests the main character looks into joining band, which turns into the main character assimilating with the band geeks. She also suggests that the main character should be in the school play and gives her the part of an old woman with her two sisters. Mrs. Gilchrist helps the main character be outgoing, feel noticed, and comfortable in casting herself as a loud and funny person. Mrs. Gilchrist sees a "nerd" in the main character and finds qualities better than those that the nerd sees in themselves.

question: Summarize everything related to Choir.

answer: The narrator is in choir with their clique of nerds. This experience brings everyone together and lets everyone sing. There is sufficient content to get to a love of singing. Additionally, it fulfills a love of music.

critique: It is omitted that the narrator is a part of the clarinet section of the band.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator is in choir with their clique of nerds.

critique: The response should be more specific about the choir experience.

critique: Does not mention her singing debut, nor does it mention that the choir is the prettiest group the narrator has ever seen.

critique: The narrator's friends aren't part of choir.

critique: There is not yet evidence supporting the the experience brings everyone together and lets everyone sing.

critique: "The narrator is in choir with their clique of nerds. This experience brings everyone together and lets everyone sing. There is sufficient content to get to a love of singing. Additionally, it fulfills a love of music." - this is all inaccurate. The narrator did not join choir with their clique of nerds. Also, she did not love singing before.

critique: The narrator's love of music is not related to choir.

critique: "The narrator is in choir with their clique of nerds." - this is irrelevant and should be removed.

critique: The narrator is not in choir with their clique of nerds.

critique: The response could be clearer in its pronoun use.

critique: The narrator enjoys acting and singing in front of a crowd. There is no need to specify a clique.

critique: The answer is made up and should be re-written.

critique: This fails to mention that Choir was its own "nerd niche" for the narrator.

critique: The response is missing some details about choir.

text: This is not a very good summary. It should include the fact that Mrs Gilchrist persuaded the main character to join the chior and that all her clarinet friends. She and her friends loved singing and would go anywhere to sing to the public.

refinement: The narrator is in choir with their clique of nerds. This experience brings everyone together and lets everyone sing. There is sufficient content to get to a love of singing. Additionally, it fulfills a love of music.

question: What did the main character love most about being a Thespian?

answer: N/A

critique: The answer is not accurate. The main character loved the rush she got from being a Thespian.

critique: The answer could be more specific about what the main character loved about being a Thespian.

critique: The answer is not accurate. The main character loved the rush of being on stage and being noticed.

critique: This is inaccurate and a misinterpretation of the text.

critique: The answer should be "the thrill of applause, the high of being complimented, and the feeling of being noticed."


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THESE STATS ON WOMEN’S CONFIDENCE WILL SHOCK YOU

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This June, I’m excited to be participating in Alexa Bigwarfe’s _Write, Publish, Sell_ online summit where I’ll give my insight on how you can develop confidence and be BOLD in your business (see below for details!).

Confidence is a popular topic in today’s media, and for good reason. It’s also a subject I write a lot about, so today, I thought I’d share some stats that demonstrate why confidence is a key topic we should _all_ be talking about.

Confidence issues affect all areas and phases of a woman’s life, including:

SELF-IMAGE:

-   Dove®’s latest research found that just 4% of women worldwide consider themselves “beautiful”.
-   Over half of women agree that they’re their own worst beauty critic.
-   By the time girls reach the tender age of 17, 78% will be “unhappy with their bodies.”
-   The Dove Self-Esteem Project found 47% of girls aged 11-14 refuse to take part in activities that might show their bodies in any way.

IN THE WORKPLACE:

-   Women’s confidence actually _declines_ (yes, _declines_) with experience: 27% of new female employees are confident they can reach top management; this drops to a mere 13% in experienced female employees.
-   In a KPMG Women’s Leadership study, 67% of women said they needed more support building confidence to feel like they can be leaders.
-   Further, women lacked the confidence to: pursue a job opportunity beyond their experience (73%); ask for a promotion (65%); request a raise (61%), or request a new role or position (56%).
-   HP once found that male employees were likely to apply for promotions when they felt they met 60% of the qualifications listed, while its female employees stayed away unless they believed they met 100% of the job qualifications.

WOMEN MAKE UP 50.8% OF THE US POPULATION, THEY’VE OUTNUMBERED MEN ON COLLEGE CAMPUSES SINCE 1988, AND THEY CONTROL 80% OF CONSUMER SPENDING IN THE US.

Yet, consider these stats:

-   % of female Fortune 500 CEOs: 4.6
-   % of females holding F500 board seats: 16.9
-   # of female CEOs in financial services industry: 0
-   # of female CEOs in health care and social assistance: 0
-   % of female creative directors in advertising: 3

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question: Summarize everything relating to self image.

answer: Dove's latest research found that just 4% of women worldwide consider themselves "beautiful". Over half of women agree that they're their own worst beauty critic. By the time girls reach the tender age of 17, 78% will be "unhappy with their bodies". The Dove Self-Esteem Project found 47% of girls aged 11-14 refuse to take part in activities that might show their bodies in any way.

critique: The last sentence is out of place, because it is not part of the stats relating to self-image.

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critique: The answer should mention that women's confidence declines with experience.

question: What does the text say about women and the workplace?

answer: According to the text, women's confidence actually declines with experience. 27% of new female employees are confident they can reach top management, but this drops to 13% in experienced female employees. 67% of women said they needed more support building confidence to feel like they can be leaders. Further, women lacked the confidence to pursue a job opportunity beyond their experience, ask for a promotion, request a raise, or request a new role or position.

critique: The answer should mention the statistics about women in the workplace.

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critique: The text also says women make up 50.8% of the US population, and that they control 80% of consumer spending. Include this information in the response as well.

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TITLE : PREMAM (2016)
STAR CAST : Naga Chaitanya, Shruti Haasan, Anupama Parameswaran
DIRECTOR : Chandoo Mondeti
PRODUCER : P. D. V. Prasad
RELEASING ON : 7 October, 2016
TELUGU MIRCHI RATING : 3.25/5

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 REVIEW : PREMAM-FULL OF LOVE!

Lover Boy Naga Chaitanya’s exciting release Premam, the official remake of Malayalam’s superhit movie Premam, has hit Box Office today and has got positive response all over. It is known the kind of impact the original Premam had on the movie lovers and this remake is sure to take Chay’s career to peaks.

STORY :

It is all about a guy who is eager to be in the feeling of love and waits for his moments. The movie clearly screens the three life phases and three beautiful love stories. The hurdles faced by this guy and how does he overcome all of them and how does he manage to finally find true love is the remaining story.

CAST PERFORMANCE :

Chay has simply done a fab job and his expressions in all the three phases were outstanding. Especially in the third love story, Chay looked much more matured and the beard is just awesome. His styling and dialogues were completely apt.

Shruti Hassan, Anupama and Madonna have done their best and lived upto the expectations. In the place of Sai Pallavi, the Malar Star, Shruti has done justice to it. On the whole, everyone in this movie has delivered their best performances.

POSITIVES :

Naga Chaitanya’s performance
Story
Music
Comedy

NEGATIVES :

Slow narration
Missing originality

HIGHLIGHTS:

Venky and Nag’s cameos
Madonna’s climax episode

TECHNICAL ASPECTS :

Chandoo Mondeti who has earlier done some typical movie has come up to add his touch of making to the original one. Few changes like adding on much more comedy and few scenes that depict the nativity of Telugu were seen.

Music was just going with the flow.Art direction was simply cool and Cinematographer should be lauded for the mind-blowing work done. Editing was clean. Overall, every aspect was embedded in such a way that the movie just felt so cool.

TELUGUMIRCHI ANALYSIS :

Premam is one such movie that has impacted the film industry in Malayalam in 2015. Even though the movie was originally shot in Malayalam many non-Malayalis have watched it with just feel. By this you can now understand the kind of impact it had on people. With the vision to reach this movie to the Telugu people, Chay thought of a remake.

Even the team has been confident for clinching success with this robust love story with it’s magical music. This movie is estimated to reach all the expectations and may touch hearts!

_GO AND WATCH THIS ONE!_

TELUGU MIRCHI RATING : 3.25/5

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Hello there! My name is Michael J. Orzechowski and I would like to submit a short story to Backhand Stories. I have finished publishing my first full collection of work entitled "This City is Dead to Me: Tales From the Land of Pleasant Living", along with other plays and novellas. I typically write darker stories with a twist and am heavily influenced by the work of E.A. Poe [which I find fitting, seeing as how I live in the wonderful city of Baltimore]. I hope you would consider this for your blog and, if you enjoy it and it gets positive feedback, I would love to share more!

I have the story copied out below and I will also attach it in a .doc file as well. Let me know if you need any more information about me, the story or anything else in between!

Thank you again
Michael J. Orzechowski

Clunk

By: Michael Orzechowski

The gallows finally came into sight. The rain was falling lightly and Glenda could feel it trickle on her forehead. She wanted nothing more than to wipe her brow, but the ropes binding her hands kept her arms firm against her side. Closing her eyes to keep the sweat from rolling in, she tripped on the cobblestone beneath her feet. As she landed on her knees, the crowd exploded in cheers. Glenda opened her eyes and searched for any sign of remorse; any preservation of her dignity. There was none.

            Glenda made her way up the creaky stairs of the platform as the ranting and raving of the audience was pushed to a halt by a short, bald man in a long brown robe. Waving his hands high in the air, he drew the attention of every man, woman and child who had traveled to the far side of town for a hanging.

            “Good people of the state!” he began, muffling the voices of the last few citizens, standing at the base of the wooden structure, “We gather here today in triumph! We gather here today in victory! We gather here to put an end to the heartache and to find closure from the events of the past few months. Here before you stands Glenda Handell. She is convicted on three counts of kidnapping and the murder of Emily, George and Gretchen Libell. She has been found guilty and been sentenced, by the court, to hang from the neck until she is dead. We only hope that God shows her the mercy that she was unable to show those poor children.”

            The crowd’s voices lifted again in a fleet of booing and screaming. The town had looked forward to this day since the three children had gone missing over two months ago. The one who looked forward to it the most, however, was James Crandon, the leader of the search. Originally a traveler from New York City, he had travelled all the way to Decker in hopes of opening his own business, but had since become the sheriff of the small town. He was one of the first out-of-state sheriffs the state of Virginia had ever had, and the townsfolk adored him.

            James was a tall man, dark in complexion with bright green eyes. His hair flowed over his shoulders, which swept back to reveal the lapels of his finely tailored jacket. He stood at the base of the gallows, biting his bottom lip in anticipation. Glenda moved her eyes over to his and shook her head. James did nothing but smile.

            Glenda knew the truth.

            It was a beautiful day out in the fields. The sun was radiating a warm glow and the trees danced in the light breeze that blew in from the north. The town was alive with workers and artists, walking the streets and making their living. Glenda stepped out of her small home and onto the dusty road. She could hear the children playing in the crop fields across the way and decided to go sit on the fence to watch them. She could see the blue on their shirts peering through the cornstalks as they bolted from side to side.

            “Tag!” one of the children would yell. “You’re it!”

            “Am not!” the other would cry, running away from the other children.

            Glenda chuckled as the kids argued back and forth. She thought to herself all the games she played when she was their age. She missed those times so dearly. She jumped off the fence and decided that she was going to join the children, despite the fact that she was still wearing her cooking gown and soft shoes.

            The fallen stalk crunched under her feet as she walked towards the children, her steps growing faster and faster until she was in a light jog. She finally reached the middle of the field to find that the children had left. Glenda circled the field, but the three where nowhere to be found.

            Glenda began to feel a warmth under her feet. The strange sensations struck fear into her heart as she looked down at her toes and wiggled them, feeling the thin, damp covering of her shoes.

Crimson.

            Glenda covered her face in horror and saw a trail of red leading to the back of the crop field. Her feet reluctantly pulled her towards the trail as tears rolled down her face. She stepped ever-so-carefully, terrified to know what was at the other end. The trail led her to an old shack in the backwoods. Her hand shook as she stretched it out to the door. The hinges squealed as she gave it a small shove and peered inside. What she saw she knew would never leave her eyes. There, standing over three motionless children, was James.

            Glenda turned and ran.

            “Ladies and gentlemen!” the man in the robe continued. “It saddens me to have to watch such a young, pretty girl like this fall into the grasps of the devil. However, the crimes you have committed are beyond that which is forgivable here on Earth. Ms. Handell, have you any words to say before you meet your fate?

            Glenda stood silent.

            James spoke up from the crowd. “The girl’s one of them mutes, Reverend. Can’t say a God damn thing if she tried.”

            Glenda hung her head in shame.

            “But worry not, Sir, I assure you, she is the culprit. I saw her do it with my own two eyes. It took me a while to track her down, but I got her. Oh, I got her.”

            The reverend stepped up to Glenda, placing a hood over her head and began whispering a prayer into her ear. Her knees shook violently as she made her way towards the noose. Glenda felt the rope fall over her nose and chin as the reverend pulled it tight to her throat. The crowd stood in awe as the trapdoor opened with a loud clunk.

title: Clunk

question: Summarize the crime that Glenda is being tried for.

answer: Glenda is being tried for three counts of kidnapping and the murder of Emily, George, and Gretchen Libell. She is convicted and sentenced to hang from the neck until she is dead.

critique: The answer should mention that Glenda is found guilty.

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critique: Glenda is convicted and sentenced to hang. It's not the same as being sentenced.

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answer: Glenda is sentenced to death for killing three children. The children seem to be the main characters of the story, and we follow them as they play in a field. The story pretends to be a children's tale, until we find out that Glenda is the one who did it, and James is the one who caught her.

critique: The answer should mention that Glenda is innocent.

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critique: "The children seem to be the main characters of the story, and we follow them as they play in a field. The story pretends to be a children's tale, until we find out that Glenda is the one who did it, and James is the one who caught her." - this was never implied anywhere in the story. This answer should be reconstructed.

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text: The plot twist is that Glenda is framed for the murder that James actually committed.

question: Summarize why Glenda did not defend herself and took the accusation and blame placed at her.

answer: Glenda is mute, so she cannot defend herself. She is also in a state of shock and confusion. The townspeople are already so furious with her and she is already so close to death that she feels she has no chance to save herself.

critique: Glenda is not in a state of shock and confusion.

critique: Glenda is mute, but she has the ability to speak. She is also not in a state of shock and confusion. She is just scared and ashamed.

critique: Glenda did not want to defend herself because James was going to kill her.

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Share the Load – Vanderhoof | Invest Local BC

We are indeed in trying times and our local Not For Profit groups Need your help.

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We are indeed in trying times and our local Not For Profit groups Need your help.

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Share the Load – Vanderhoof | Invest Local BC

To all our great community supporters let’s get this campaign moving. Remember 100% of what you donate will go the charity. Community Futures Stuart Nechako is donating all fees back to the campaign.
School District 91 Nechako Healthy Community Alliance Bulkley Nechako Opportunities Nechako Valley Food Network Vanderhoof Hospice Society St John Hospital Auxiliary Society

You may change the contribution amount if you are ONLY Contributing to one charity; or you can simply add them to your cart one at a time.

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You may change the contribution amount if you are ONLY Contributing to one charity; or you can simply add them to your cart one at a time.

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UPDATE: So FB has not exactly been my friend today. This campaign is live and the link to donate to all of these great charities is in the comments

While we encourage all to support our local businesses we can not forget about the great work our Not For Profits do with limited resources and volunteers. This is a reachout to all those great organizations to see if we can set up a local campaign to assist in some fund raising activites. If you think we can help please let me know. I am hoping to launch the campaign over the Easter weekend.
Please share this post and like the page to make sure you get info. Stay safe and practice kindness.

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Due to the COVID-19 virus pandemic we have reactivated Investlocalbc.ca for use by the public. In these time there are many non profits and businesses that could use some financial help.

Crowdfunding may not answer everyone's problem but it provides a place where people can connect to talk about problems and their solutions.

The solution to an individual problem may not only be cash..A businessperson may need other types of help, mentoring, etc..
At Investlocalbc you customize your ask to your needs.

Stay safe and Healthy

Graham

The COVID-19 virus outbreak means we need to get the crowdfunding option to the public of rural BC so the public can support innovations, non profits and other situations that may be necessary as we go through this pandemic together..Due to this emergency, we will have Investlocalbc.ca operating as the crowdfunding answer for BC's non profits and businesses by the end of the week. Graham

We are working on changes to the Investlocalbc site to create opportunities to bring ideas and investment together for rural communities. We have found in our research that cooperative ownership provide opportunity for working people to be involved in their local economy..We will be live soon....

Hello Everyone,

We are in the process of revising investlocalbc and its services. While the practise of community based crowdfunding has not been established in BC, we at investlocalbc have identified the needs of rural Enterprising people in venture capital and short term financing are not being serviced. The objective is that a person will not have to go to urban centres to secure financing and investment. We will be building a network of angel investors, lender, social funds, etc. to serve the needs of rural BC.

We'll see if we get back to exploring crowdfunding as a community development tool in the future.

Regards,

Graham

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[A Pua Kumbu in Sheepstor parish church, on Dartmoor. It was donated to the church by the people of Sarawak in memory of the White Rajahs.]

PUA KUMBU is a traditional patterned multicolored ceremonial cotton cloth used by the Iban people in Sarawak, Malaysia.

Legends on the origins of Iban weaving

There are many legends about the origin of Pua Kumbu, all revolving around the characters of Menggin and Dara Tinchin. The story starts with Menggin, an Iban hunter who shot a beautiful bird with his blowpipe. As he ran to retrieve his game, what he found was a woven skirt instead of a bird. He kept the woven skirt as he had never seen one before. However, he did not know that it belonged to Dara Tinchin Temaga, eldest daughter of a petara known as Singalang Burong. She was looking for her kain everywhere. When she met Menggin, he returned the skirt. In return, Dara married Menggin, although she was already married. She brought him to her home, the other world, the land of the Gods. They also had a son, Sera Gunting. After a year, Dara’s first husband returned home. She asked Menggin and Sera to return to the Iban world and for their journey to wear a jacket known as baju burong and her kain that she had woven. From that day onwards, the jacket and kain have been passed down to many Iban women so they can weave the same designs and remain close to the Gods. And that is how the weaving of pua kumbu began.[1][2]

Dyeing and weaving process

The process starts with preparing the yarn for the weaving, which consists of the following:

-   NABU’ - winding the thread into balls
-   MUAI - to sort out
-   NGIRIT - the process of stretching and pulling a skin of thread horizontally, one thead at a time, to form the base or warp
-   NGARAP - the selection of alternate warp
-   NGEBAT - tying
-   MAMPUL - to cover
-   MUKA’ TANCHANG - untying
-   NGEREMBAI - unfolding
-   ANAK and ARA – adding side designs

Weaving

In order to prepare for the weaving process, the yarns are unfolded and carefully arranged on a wooden frame. Before the actual weaving begins, the side sections of the unfolded yarn known as anak or ara are carefully arranged. Nenun or Weaving is done using a backstrap loom placed in a convenient spot within the longhouse. The final stage involves finishing of the top and bottom edges with a crowfeet pattern.

Dyeing

All of the raw materials for the natural dyes are harvested from the rainforest. The Iban have traditionally made use of a large number of plants to produce a range of rich beautiful dyes. The rengat plant produces an ‘indigo’ colour in many different tones. The akar penawar landak is used to obtain yellow color dye. For the Engkudu dye, if kapok or quicklime is added the colour will turn brown. The yarn is dipped into the combination, turned until it is well saturated and left to soak before it is dried under the sun. after the dye process yarns are further prepared by tying sections to build up the design.[3][4]

Further reading

-   Traude Gavin, _Iban Ritual Textiles_. KITLV Press. 2003. xi, pp. 356 ().
-   “Pua Kumbu,” _The Asian Civilisations Museum A-Z Guide to its Collections_. p. 258. Asian Civilisations Museum. 2003. National Heritage Board, Singapore.

[1] http://rhgareh.com, adapted from Margaret Linggi “The ties that bind” (2001) & story told by Bangie ak Embol

[2] Textile tales of Pua Kumbu – Polysensory Intermedia Exhibition, published by University of Malaya

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question: Summarize the origin of Pua Kumbu.

answer: Pua Kumbu originated with Menggin, an Iban hunter who was hunting and shot a beautiful bird, but the bird turned out to be an intricate weaving. Menggin kept the weaving and Dara Tinchin Temaga, an Iban, found it. She was looking for her kain that she had woven, so she asked Menggin to return it to her. In exchange, he asked her to marry him as he had never seen anything like the woven skirt. Dara married Menggin and had a son, Sera Gunting. When Dara's husband returned, Menggin and Sera were asked to return to the Iban world. They both wore a jacket and kain, the designs of which would be passed down through the generations in order to weave them.

critique: The answer is a summary of the origin of Pua Kumbu, which is not what the question asks for. The answer should be re-written.

critique: The answer should mention that the kain and jacket were passed down through the generations to weave them.

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critique: Both Mother and son were asked to return to the Iban world.

critique: The story of Menggin and Dara Tinchin Temaga is only one of many legends about the origin of Pua Kumbu. The answer should mention this.

critique: The answer is a summary of the legend, not the origin of the weaving.

question: Summarize the process of Pua Kumbu weaving.

answer: The yarn is unfolded and carefully arranged on a wooden frame. Before the actual weaving begins, the side sections of the yarn known as anak or ara are carefully arranged. Nenun or Weaving is done using a backstrap loom placed in a convenient spot within the longhouse. The final stage involves finishing of the top and bottom edges with a crowfeet pattern.

critique: The answer should mention the dyeing process.

critique: Add that the yarn is dyed before weaving.

question: Summarize how the yarn is dyed for Pua Kumbu weaving.

answer: Since it is a handmade traditional product, the chemical dyes are not used. The yarn is dipped into a combination of chemical dyes and organic dyes to obtain the desired colors of the yarn. The yarn is then dried and further prepared to form patterns.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The yarn is dipped into natural dyes made from the rainforest. The dyes are not chemical.


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CHINESE ANIMAL PROTECTION NETWORK (CAPN) is a non-profit animal protection organization, and the first network for animal protection in China, founded by Chinese people. CAPN is known for its pioneering role in the animal rights movement in China, leading the growing movement against eating cats and dogs, and providing a free encyclopedia on animal welfare information.

History

The Chinese Animal Protection Network was founded by Dr. Jenia Meng in 2004, with its first project, the Chinese Companion Animal Protection Network.[1] Since then, the organization has initiated projects targeting issues such as lab animal rights, vegetarianism, and opposition to indiscriminate culling as a method of population control of animals.[2] Those projects have led the direction of Chinese non-governmental organizations.[3]

By 2008, the organization had 48 member groups, two branches, and more than 20,000 individual supporters.[4] The organization reported on its website in 2014, that its network has expanded to reach almost every part of China, with more than 200 partner groups around world.[5]

Philosophy

CAPN has a science-based philosophy of animal rights.[6] They oppose violence in the animal rights movement, and see animal rights as a dynamic concept; they believe the rights of different animals are different because their needs are different. Six keys of the organization's philosophy, developed in 2008, include:[7]

-   unity: the philosophy of animal rights is a part of a universal law; scientific disciplines such as mathematics, physics, chemistry, and biology have shown through the years that the universe is interrelated.
-   complexity: everyone has his/her own view of animal rights. Different organizations, academics, and even animal rights activists have different viewpoints; when working with people and organizations, one should always keep in mind this diversity of viewpoints.
-   evolution: human understanding of animal rights is evolving, as with all other areas of human knowledge. Science and technology is developing to help humans better understand the universe and their place in the universe; it is natural that our understanding of animal rights will continue to evolve.
-   continuity: continuity exists between everything, from human to nonhuman animals, from more human-related animals to less related animals. The difference is not discrete but gradual. CAPN advocates to analyze specific issues, due to the different needs of individual animals.
-   originality: the concept of animal rights is not a new concept, as three pillars of traditional Chinese thought, Buddhism, Taoism, and Confucianism, all have teachings regarding respect towards animals.

Projects

Chinese Companion Animal Protection Network

The Chinese Companion Animal Protection Network (CCAPN) was launched in 2004 at the founding of CAPN.[8] The campaign against eating cats and dogs was the first concern of CCAPN. “Isolated animal welfare organisations were already working to rescue strays by then, but consumption of dogs and cats hadn’t made it onto their agenda. Indeed, these groups were unconvinced that stopping people from eating one or two particular species was anything but an exercise in arbitrary morality. So CAPN sought to reframe the debate as one about cruelty rather than taste,”[9] thereby working to reduce the consumer market. Supported by international groups including the Royal Society for the Prevention of Cruelty to Animals and World Animal Protection, the organization worked to link animal-lovers across China and educate the public about the facts of the trade, for example that “many of the 10,000 cats consumed daily in winter in Guangdong province (where the meat is considered a warming food) are stolen from other provinces”.[10]

In 2007, the organization “launched an online 'signing event' which asked people to pledge to avoid cat and dog meat in future. In the following five months, it collected 21,000 signatures.”[11]

CCAPN's website in 2014 offers information on controlling rabies in dog populations through vaccination rather than culling, information on controlling domestic cat populations in urban areas through trap-neuter-return rather than culling, and how to create an animal protection agency.[12]

Animal Rights website and encyclopedia

The Animal Rights in China website was launched on 22 July 2006, and is the major portal for animal rights issues in China. Academic research on animal ethics and networking of animal rights activists are important functions of this project. It is developing a Chinese online encyclopedia of animal protection (APpedia).[13][14]

The main objective of APpedia () was to establish an online Chinese encyclopedia of animal protection. The project currently has more than 90 academic researchers and affiliated organizations around world.[15][16]

APpedia is published online as a free-of-charge eBook and a website. The content of the APpedia includes, but is not limited to: Science, religion, events, animal behavior, philosophy, important figures, animal protection, advocacy, animal welfare, animal rights, animal protection organizations, reviews of books.

The beta version of APpedia website was launched in 2007, as a wiki website, visitors are allowed to modify the articles on the website without registration. Overall the project has a pro animal rights position. A derivative of the project, a book with the same title, was published 2009 in Australia.

The sponsors of the free knowledge project include World Society for the Protection of Animals and Culture & Animals Foundation.[17][18]

POVchina

POVchina is an information portal for vegetarianisms. It is known for using interactive computer games in public education.[19]

Notable contributions

-   CAPN works closely with domestic, international, and overseas organizations working in China, providing advice and support for their work.
-   CAPN runs a campaign against cat-and-dog-eating (the practice of eating cat meat or dog meat). They are the first group to use the slogan 'Stop eating cats and dogs' in their campaign. They also coordinated many groups in more than ten cities in China to join this campaign. This slogan has been adopted by animal rights groups around the country. They launched the online-signing event against consumption of cat and dog meat in 2007, which received over 40,000 signatures. Their campaign has led to a large amount of publicity and discussion of this issue among the public.
-   CAPN runs a campaign against animal hoarding. They led a large-scale online debate on the topic in 2006, and later published two research documents regarding animal hoarding, the first of their kind to be published in Chinese. They are the major contributors to a change in the pro-hoarding climate of China.
-   CAPN provides a network for animal protection groups. They are the first organization devoted to the unity of Chinese animal protection communities.[20]
-   In April 2008, CAPN introduced World Lab Animal Day to China for the first time.[21]

Awards

CAPN projects have won several awards:

-   Jan 2008: CCAPN won 'great contribution to animal protection in 2007' award in 'Animals in China' Shanghai conference.
-   Mar 2008: ARC won funding for its online encyclopedia from Cultural and Animal Foundation, which is established and chaired by animal rights philosopher Tom Regan.

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[14] Animal Rights In China, Michael Charles Tobias, Forbes (online), accessed September 6, 2014

[15] J.Meng et al. APpedia 2009 Ultravisum

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[18] Culture & Animals Foundation, past grants recipients: http://www.cultureandanimals.org/grantrec.html

[19] POVchina website

[20] CAPN introduction and Achievement

[21] The First World Lab Animal Day (WLAD) in China

title: Chinese Animal Protection Network

question: What is CAPN's philosophy of animal rights?

answer: They see animal rights as a dynamic concept; they believe the rights of different animals are different because their needs are different, and that continuum exists between everything, from human to nonhuman animals.

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critique: "The campaign against eating cats and dogs was the first concern of CCAPN." - this is incorrect. The first concern of CCAPN was the campaign against eating cats and dogs. The answer should be "The campaign against eating cats and dogs."

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critique: This is inaccurate. The campaign didn't become their first concern until later.

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critique: The answer should mention some of the features of the website, such as the encyclopedia.

critique: The answer should mention the encyclopedia.

question: What are some of the notable contributions of CAPN?

answer: CAPN works closely with domestic, international, and overseas organizations working in China, providing advice and support for their work. CAPN runs a campaign against cat-and-dog-eating (the practice of eating cat meat or dog meat). They are the first group to use the slogan 'Stop eating cats and dogs' in their campaign. They also coordinated many groups in more than ten cities in China to join this campaign. This slogan has been adopted by animal rights groups around the country. They launched the online-signing event against consumption of cat and dog meat in 2007, which received over 40,000 signatures. Their campaign has led to a large amount of publicity and discussion of this issue among the public. CAPN runs a campaign against animal hoarding. They led a large-scale online debate on the topic in 2006, and later published two research documents regarding animal hoarding, the first of their kind to be published in Chinese. They are the major contributors to a change in the pro-hoarding climate of China. CAPN provides a network for animal protection groups. They are the first organization devoted to the unity of Chinese animal protection communities. In April 2008, CAPN introduced World Lab Animal Day to China for the first time.


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The ESTADIO BBVA, nicknamed “El Gigante de Acero”[1] (Spanish for “The Steel Giant”), is a stadium developed by FEMSA and C.F. Monterrey in Guadalupe, Greater Monterrey. The stadium replaced the Estadio Tecnológico as the home of Monterrey, ending 63 years of residency at that stadium. The project was met with much controversy, stemming from multiple accusations of the construction as an apparent impediment to wildlife growth on a local scale. [2] It was inaugurated on 2 August 2015 with the eighth edition of the Eusébio Cup, where Monterrey defeated Benfica 3–0.[3][4]

Design

The stadium was designed by multinational architecture firm Populous along with the Mexican firm VFO.[5] David Lizarraga of Populous served as lead architect for the project.[6] Construction began in August 2011 and was completed in July 2015.[7]

The stadium was opened in 2015 with a capacity of 51,000 people, making it the fourth largest in Mexico. Built at a cost of US$200 million, it was the most expensive stadium in Mexico at the time of its construction.[8] The owners soon added more seats, expanding the capacity to 53,500 in 2016.[9] It has a grass surface, suites, a club-themed restaurant, a club lounge, and high-end interior and exterior design.[10] The inclination of the grandstand is 34 degrees, and the distance between the field and seats is the minimum allowed by FIFA, providing closeness to the action.[11]

Estadio BBVA received a silver certification from the Leadership in Energy and Environmental Design for its sustainable design. It was the first football stadium in North America to earn the certification.[12]

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More than a third of the total land area are green areas.[13] This proportion exceeds the current regulations. These green areas are used to filter rainwater, which will contribute to the recharge of aquifers. Parking lots are evenly distributed around the stadium, including wooded areas to achieve integration with the Ecological Park.[14] These areas are divided into zones, which are integrated into the landscape and topography. The northern boundary to the Rio La Silla is a wooded trail area that connects the stadium with the New Ecological Park.[15] This ecological park and parking are also green areas, with a landscape design that blends with the surrounding environment, with only trees and plants of the region to facilitate preservation and adaptation to the environment.

Concerts

Singer Justin Bieber performed at the stadium on 15 February 2017 as part of his Purpose World Tour. Over 51,000 people attended the concert.[16]

[1] https://www.mediotiempo.com/futbol/copa-mx/rayados-paso-igualar-record-historico-cruz-azul

[2] http://www.greenpeace.org/mexico/es/Noticias/2011/Octubre/No-acaben-con-el-ultimo-pulmon-de-Monterrey-ONG/

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title: Estadio BBVA

question: Summarize the environmentalism-related aspects of the stadium.

answer: The stadium is built surrounding a third of the land in green areas to filter rain water, which will help to recharge the aquifer and avoid flooding of the nearby areas. The northern boundary to nearby The Rio La Silla is a wooded trail area that connects to a nearby park. The grounds are evenly distributed around the stadium and it also has wooded and parking lots that integrate well with the natural environment.

critique: The answer should mention the LEED certification.

critique: The stadium is not built surrounding a third of the land in green areas; a third of the total land area are green areas.

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critique: The stadium is not built surrounding a third of the land in green areas.

critique: The response repeated almost the same description three times. It should focus more on 'the region' which is more important.

question: What does the article say about the events at the stadium?

answer: The stadium was designed by Populous and VFO and was opened with a capacity of 51,000 people in 20115. Its capacity was expanded in 2016 to 53,500. Its sustainable design received a Leadership in Energy and Environment Design certification. Justin Bieber performed at the stadium in 2017 for the Purpose World Tour.

critique: The stadium's capacity was opened in 2015, not 20115.

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question: What does the article say about the Monterrey fans' reception?

answer: The stadium was met with much controversy, stemming from multiple accusations of the construction as an apparent impediment to wildlife growth on a local scale. The stadium was inaugurated by Monterrey's home win over Benfica.

critique: The response is missing the part about the reception of the stadium by the Monterrey fans.

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[Home in Miami County] JOHN JOHNSTON was an Indian agent in the United States Northwest Territory. He was born on 25 March 1775 near Ballyshannon in the north of Ireland. His father was Scottish and his mother was a Huguenot. He left Ireland when he was eleven years old, travelling to America with a priest and a trusted family friend who was also his tutor. When he emigrated to Pennsylvania in 1786, his father, mother, four brothers, and one sister remained in Ireland.[1] They came to America five years after he settled here.

Johnston's career with Native Americans started as a wagoner for General Anthony Wayne's Legion of the United States.[2] He returned to Pennsylvania after the campaign and worked as a law clerk. At age 27, Johnston met Rachel Robinson, who was 16. They eloped to Lancaster, Ohio and were married on 15 July 1802. They had 15 children - the first 4 were the first all-white children to be born at Ft. Wayne (now Fort Wayne, Indiana). 14 of their 15 children lived into adulthood.[3]

In 1802, President Thomas Jefferson appointed Johnston as Indian Agent at the new trading agency in Fort Wayne, and by 1809 he was in charge of two Indian Agencies.[4] His primary responsibility was to manage trade so that Indians in the area would not seek trade with the nearby British. Johnston was responsible to the territorial governor, William Henry Harrison, and to the Superintendent of Indian Trade. Almost immediately, however, a rivalry began between Johnston and William Wells, the official interpreter at Fort Wayne. The Miami of Fort Wayne trusted Wells, who had been adopted into their tribe, while U.S. government officials questioned Wells' loyalty and sided with Johnston.[5] Johnston remained at Fort Wayne through a period of growing resentment between the American Indians and the United States,[6] and filed a report summarizing Indian accounts of the Battle of Tippecanoe in 1811.[7]

That same year, an Indian agency was established at Piqua, Ohio, and Johnston asked to be transferred to the new agency. He was at this agency during the War of 1812, and organized a Shawnee party under Captain Logan to rescue women and children during the Siege of Fort Wayne, where his brother, Stephen, was killed.[8] He had much better relations with the local Shawnee and Wyandot than he had with the Indians at Fort Wayne, and served as Indian Agent until 1829. He helped negotiate the Treaty of Upper Sandusky in 1842, which removed the Wyandot from Ohio to the West.[9] It was reported that he earned a $1200.00 salary per year as an agent, and he retained that position until let go by President Jackson - a total of thirty-one years.[10]

Johnston was a Whig, and in 1844 was one of Ohio's delegates to the Whig Party's national convention. After the convention, he travelled to campaign for Henry Clay.

Besides his duties as an Indian agent, he also contributed to many other facets of Ohio. He was a canal commissioner with Ohio for eleven years, president of the historical and philosophical societies in Ohio, and founder of the first Sunday school in Miami County, Ohio.[11] John Johnston was also founder of Kenyon College, served on the board of trustees of Miami University, and was a member of the board at West Point.[12] He wrote _Indian Tribes in Ohio_[13] before he died in 1861 in Washington, D.C. Today, his Piqua farm maintained by the Ohio Historical Society.

John and Rachel Johnston were married for 38 years before his wife died on 24 July 1840, after eleven days of illness. The bereavement after the death of his wife in the family home, caused him to leave and move to Cincinnati with a daughter, and then later to Dayton, where he died in 1861 at the age of 86.[14]

Notes

[1] History of Miami County Ohio - Col. John Johnston. Piqua Public Library (3 Files)

[2] Thornbrough, 12

[3] Johnston Farm Ohio

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[6] Burnhart, pg 375-378

[7] Burnhart, pg 391, fn 38

[8] Shelby County History, link below

[9] Ohio Historical Society

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[12] Ohio History Central, link below

[13] Hill, 1957

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title: John Johnston (Indian agent)

question: What does the text say about Johnston's personal life?

answer: Johnston was born in 1775 near Ballyshannon in the north of Ireland. His father was Scottish and his mother was a Huguenot. He left Ireland when he was eleven years old, travelling to America with a priest and a trusted family friend who was also his tutor. When he emigrated to Pennsylvania in 1786, his father, mother, four brothers, and one sister remained in Ireland. They came to America five years after he settled here.

critique: Johnston met Rachel Robinson when he was 27. They were married 15 years later and had 15 children. Include this information in the response.

question: What does the text say about Johnston's work at Fort Wayne?

answer: Johnston worked at Fort Wayne as an Indian agent. His primary responsibility was to manage trade so that Indians in the area would not seek trade with the nearby British. Almost immediately, however, a rivalry began between Johnston and William Wells, the official interpreter at Fort Wayne. The Miami of Fort Wayne trusted Wells, who had been adopted into their tribe, while U.S. government officials questioned Wells' loyalty and sided with Johnston. Johnston remained at Fort Wayne through a period of growing resentment between the American Indians and the United States.

critique: Johnston's primary responsibility was to manage trade so that Indians in the area would not seek trade with the nearby British.

text: It would be helpful to include the years Johnston worked at Fort Wayne.

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question: What does the text say about Johnston's cause of death?

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                                          Me

	Before we get into the depths of this story, I assume you are going to want to know about me. Who am I? Where did I come from? All that basic shit. And the truth is, who I am isn’t all the different from who the girl next door to you is. My situations have made me unique and the fact that I observe has made me different.

	At this point in time, I am 19 years old. I am slightly overweight, but you wouldn’t notice from looking at me. I have hips that one day will make giving birth easy but for now just make black guys go dammmmmnnnn girrllll. I have shoulder length hair that is some weird boxed shade of red that I dyed it out of anger. The cut was out of anger too. I’m 5’3.5 and yes that half an inch does matter. I wear a dress almost every day, not because I’m particularly girly anymore, but because it’s really all I have from my last relationship which was particularly controlling. I have two tattoos. One of an owl rests on my left ankle and the kittens from the aristocats parade around my right ribcage. Appearances make a person. This is why I am going so in depth so you can know me. My eyes, well they aren’t important. I want you too see my situations through your eyes. So take your eyes, put them on me, and there we go.

	As someone told me, my personality is weird. I took compliments when I was called quirky. Eccentric even was nice. Now I have just gone off the deep end, into plain weird. But, as you will learn, I was not always this way. I once had it together and knew how to control the weirdness. Now it just kinda spews out like some verbal garbage. It’s gross. But if people can laugh at me and their day is brightened, then awesome. I am someone what a perfectionist. Okay, complete lie there. I am a total perfectionist. I have a little motto in my head that say I must be “prim and proper and polite” at all times. I am working on this. As we all know, this is impossible. I did not know this until recently. The fact that I thought I could be perfect has led me to many a mental illness which we will get into latter. That is not important when trying to learn about the essence of me. And I think the essence of me which you need to know is that I am quirky, caring, and I can see into your soul weather you want me too our not.

	That last part is a little creepy, but that is besides the point. I will know when you want help or need help, regardless if you think you do. And that freaks most people out. I’ve had this super lame “gift” since I can remember. It’s more of a hassle than anything and leaves me stressed out. At any given moment I am flipping through my phone seeing if  I have someone’s number to see if they are ok. I can usually tell you exactly what’s wrong with them, and that’s kinda sucky too. People think this is total BS until I call them at 10pm at night and tell them that no, they should not go spend their last $20 on a little bit of weed. That they should take some advil and a bath and go to sleep and they will be just fine. Just wait till I do it to you. You will be scared. The knowing what’s up with everyone has gotten my head into a tizzy more often than once. I don’t stop to smell the roses or you know think about myself and eat sometimes, because I get so worked up about everyone else. Maybe that shows a great thing about my character. Maybe not.

	I think the most important thing that you know about me is, I did lose me for awhile. For a good chunk of 2 year I would say. I think I was brain washed. I really don’t know. But when you fall under the spell of a sociopath’s love, you do what they want. Not to say I never loved him, because I did, and still do, and probably always will, but he screwed me up. When you are 16 and 17 and 18 you should be finding who you are. Not being pushed into some mold. And if you get anything out of what I write it is that. Because here I am at 19, trying to make up for lost time and it sucks. But like everything else, we will get back to that lost time, we will get back to the sociopath I love(d). Because, while love is insignificant, it is important. Expecially when you can say it helped create the monster the in your head.

	There are other little things about me that aren’t important. Hobbies, jobs held, heck even friends. These will fall into place when they need to. Setting of my life is a small town in California. Just think of where you live, it’s much like that. A suburban town with nothing to do, no where to go. Tons of time to get trapped in your head. I want you to step into my shoes, but don’t lose who you are. We are one on this journey. And you are in for a ride.

title: The beginning of my short life story

question: Why might the author narrator feel awkward about themselves?

answer: They feel they are not perfect.

critique: The answer omitted the main reason why the narrator feels awkward about themselves.

critique: The answer should mention the author's gift.

critique: The narrator feels awkward because they are a perfectionist and they are not perfect.

critique: The answer should mention the gift of being able to see into people's souls.

critique: It's omitted that the author feels awkward because they feel they are not perfect.