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I could feel the eyes on me, countless and faceless among the trees. Their ceaseless stare laid upon my back, my head, my arms like hands longing to grasp me. But still I watched the fire.

The edge of the forest approached close enough to be brushed lightly by the glow of the flame. On the moonless night, the flicker was not enough to give the eyes faces. Obediently, they waited in the darkness of the timber. Even so, they were my only company.  I sat alone in my small clearing in the thick woods, as I had every night since the last time I saw another human being nearly a fortnight ago. The steel of the hatchet was cool on my thumb as I stroked the blade mindlessly.

I went inside my canvas tent, the walls painted orange by the dying fire outside. The late September night had brought a chill to the air and I got beneath my goose down blanket and readied for sleep. Laying alone in the forest, I watched the white fabric of the tent. The glow slowly dimmed and soon the light was gone. And the watchful eyes were freed from the shadows. I could feel them outside the tent. I closed my eyes and thought only about the sunrise.

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The sun set as I finished the rabbit I had caught and cooked that day. I added more wood to the fire and watched as the stars slowly began to appear, one by one, in the darkening night. As with the stars, so did the eyes.

I felt the first pair fall upon me as the blanket of darkness covered the trees. These were swiftly followed by a second, and a third. Soon, between every tree, I felt a piercing stare. I shot mine back. They were intelligent, staying in the darkness, unseen. Two weeks ago, when the moon was full, they were not so close. They were up the tree line 40 or 50 meters. But tonight they were at the forest's edge, watching me, only using the last trees to take shelter from the firelight.

They had been watching me every night for two weeks.  They could see me. I could only feel them. And I could do nothing about it. Two weeks and all we had done was watch each other. Furiously, from the firelight, I screamed at them.

“What do you want from me?”

The only answer from the shadows was my own echoing rage. The sound softened until it was no more. The night was again silent. No sounds came from the forest, as when a predator is present.

“Who are you?”

 I screamed again. I knew there would be no answer, but my newfound energy from the rabbit had manifested into rage. I was standing now, holding the hatchet low in my right hand, staring past the fire into the blackness. The eyes in the trees only stared back.

I had had enough. I walked to the stump next to the tent and threw my hatchet into it. I went to my pack and put it on. I took my bucket of freshwater and poured it on the fire. There was a flash of steam and the blazing flames were replaced by simmering embers. And I stared into the trees.

I could hear my heartbeat in the silence. I stayed standing and watching, but they did not move. The coals slowly died as I stared, unblinking, into the trees. I had never been in such darkness.  My breath was quick and shallow, trying to keep pace with my heart. And they stared.

“Why are you here?” I yelled. I needed a release and knew there would not be an answer. I took a step forward toward the the tree line and listened. Nothing. I took another. And then another. There was no response. I kept walking towards the trees and I left my hatchet deep in the log. And they kept watching every step, dutifully, unbreakably.

I was at the edge of the tree line now, and I was trying to control my breath. I stared at the darkness between two trees in front of me. We were face to face. I could feel it. It was formless and confident.  I stood tall and straight, trying to prove my confidence.  It backed away into the trees and I followed.

Somehow, in the trees, it was even darker. I could not see my hand in front of my face. I could not see the stars in the sky. Passing through the trees, I followed its eyes that I could feel heavy on my chest. Then I felt another gaze on my shoulder. Then one on my back. They had surrounded me. I was outnumbered and in their territory. The crept in close, increasing their pressure. My heart beat from my chest as I tried to stand tall, alone in the black forest. Closer they came. I could feel its breath on my face now.

“What are you!” I grabbed the magnesium hand flare from my pack and lit it. The crimson light illuminated the forest.

“Jesus Christ,” I said aloud and spun around holding the flair high. It showed an empty forest. The dancing red light only shone upon the trees, the dirt, and myself. The piercing stares were gone. I turned around with the flair a few more times to make sure I believed what I knew. I turned around and around until the flare went out and I walked back through the trees, unbothered, to my camp.

I sat in my chair in the darkness and watched the stars. I had never seen so many in my entire life. I left the hatchet deep in the log.

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Thanks for reading! Feedback is much appreciated! I had to give up writing when I switched majors from Creative Writing to Physics. Now that I graduated, this is the first thing I've written in 3 years. So tear it up! I need it. Feel free to analyze what you got out of it, too. I would like to know what it meant to you.

title: [MF] The Eyes

question: How is the theme of courage and perseverance shown in the story?

answer: The narrator is alone in the woods, and has been for two weeks. He is being watched by eyes in the woods, and he has no idea why. He is afraid, but he is also determined to find out what is happening. He is courageous enough to go into the woods to find out what is happening. He is persevering in his search for the answer to what is happening.

critique: The line "He is persevering in his search for the answer to what is happening" is not clear.

critique: The answer only mentions the narrator's activities.

critique: The phrasing of the first sentence could be clearer.


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text:
EMILE BOULOS RUSTOM (; born 27 March 1952) is a Lebanese football coach and former player.

After playing with Sagesse for 22 years, and the Lebanon national team for nine, he became Sagesse's coach in 2005. He then coached Nejmeh, Shabab Sahel, Safa, and Ansar. He is the first coach to win the Lebanese Premier League with two different teams (Nejmeh and Safa), as well as the first coach to coach both cross-city rivals Nejmeh and Ansar. Rustom also coached Lebanon, from 2008 to 2011.

Rustom is the father of Paul, a former Lebanese Premier League and Lebanon national team player.

Club career

Rustom made his league debut for Sagesse on 23 December 1966, against Antranik at the Habib Abou Chahla Stadium.[1] He played for Sagesse for 22 years, before retiring in 1988.[2]

International career

Rustom played the Lebanon national team for nine years,[3] representing them at the 1980 AFC Asian Cup qualifiers in 1979.[4]

Managerial career

He began coaching in 2005, becoming the manager of his former club Sagesse.[5] In 2008, Rustom became the manager of both Nejmeh, with whom he remained until 2010, and the Lebanon national team.[6] With Nejmeh, Rustom won the 2008–09 Lebanese Premier League, and the 2009 Lebanese Super Cup.[7] He coached Lebanon until 2011, before being re-appointed coach of Lebanon once again, on 5 May 2011.[8] However, after less than three months, on 3 August Rustom resigned.[9]

After coaching Shabab Sahel during the 2013–14 season, in 2015 Rustom became manager of Safa.[10] He won the 2015–16 league title with them, becoming the first coach to win the Lebanese Premier League with two different teams.[11] In 2017 Rustom coached Ansar; he became the first coach to manage both Nejmeh and Ansar, who contest the _Beirut derby_.[12] However, after losing both the Lebanese Elite Cup and Lebanese Super Cup prior to the 2017–18 league season, Rustom resigned.[13]

On 20 July 2020, Rustom was re-appointed head coach of Safa ahead of the 2020–21 season.[14] He resigned on 2 November 2020.[15]

Personal life

Rustom is married to Salwa Abou Sleiman, and has three children: Paul, Laurence, and Elie.[16] Paul played in the Lebanese Premier League and for the Lebanon national team.[17]

Rustom holds a master's degree in French language and literature, in addition to training certificates from the French Federation (1981) and the Brazilian Academy (1984).[18][19] In 2005 Rustom was the vice-president of Sagesse, as well as the chairman of their technical committee.[20]

Honours

Manager

NEJMEH

-   Lebanese Premier League: 2008–09
-   Lebanese Super Cup: 2009

SAFA

-   Lebanese Premier League: 2015–16

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-   Lebanese Premier League Coach of the Season: 2008–09, 2015–16

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title: Emile Rustom

question: Summarize Rustom's career as a player.

answer: Rustom made his league debut for Sagesse on 23 December 1966, against Antranik at the Habib Abou Chahla Stadium. He played for Sagesse for 22 years, before retiring in 1988.

critique: It is not stated that he played for Sagesse for 22 years.

question: Summarize Rustom's notable achievements.

answer: Rustom is the first coach to win the Lebanese Premier League with two different teams (Nejmeh and Safa). He is also the first coach to coach both cross-city rivals Nejmeh and Ansar. Rustom coached the Lebanon national team from 2008 to 2011. He also made his league debut for Sagesse on 23 December 1966.

critique:
-He coached both cross-city rival Nejmeh and Ansar. It is omitted that he was the first coach in doing so.
-The specific teams he coached for the Lebanese national team should be identified and put in the right order.

critique: The last sentence is irrelevant to the question.

critique: "He also made his league debut for Sagesse on 23 December 1966." - is irrelevant and should be deleted.

critique: The answer should mention that Rustom is the first coach to win the Lebanese Premier League with two different teams.

critique: The last sentence is not a notable achievement.

critique: The last sentence is not a notable achievement and should be removed.

question: What does the article say about Rustom's career outside of football?

answer: No answer

critique: It is omitted that he holds a degree in French language and literature in addition to training certificates from the French Federation and the Brazilian Academy.

critique: The answer should acknowledge that the article does not mention anything about Rustom's career outside of football.


text:
Abstract Art
When I was little, I used to draw
A lot.
I drew with pens on napkins while waiting
For food at restaurants.
I would scribble with crayons on the kids menus,
Ignoring the coloring exercises with strict lines that
I was told to color within. I guess it
Felt good to not follow the rules.  I was told
That I couldn’t, or that I wasn’t allowed to as a child.
The Menu would tell me to color in the star, or
Connect the dots. I would use my outside voice to yell
At the menu, saying, that I wasn’t going to follow the rules this time,
But I yelled in my head. I guess it good to be able
To efface the something that an adult had set out,
Had expected me to do. My four-pack of crayons was
My sled, and the coloring menu was a hill that I
Was told to shovel, but instead chose to sled down.

I would grab paper out of the
Printer when I was bored. I would walk
Into the kitchen, grasp the newest markers from the drawer
With my eager hands.  Drawing, I would discard the
Dried out markers that left faded lines on the blank page,
I only accepted the makers that left a wet, thick,
Glossy mark that created a chemical reaction
In my body, leaving me wanting to draw more.
I would draw lines, straight lines, curved lines, pipes that
Led to circles and squares, patterns that
Repeated, semicircles that turned outwards like
Petals on flower, and curved triangles that
Looked like the leaves of palm trees. I remember thinking
That the palm leaves were cool because
I thought of them, not anyone else. They weren’t
Anything that I was taught to draw in school, or
Something I saw on TV, they were mine.  My parents
Would see me coloring, and I would cover it up
With my arms, telling them to wait until I was done.
They would gawk when they saw it, asking me what it was.
I would respond with “I dunno.” Then one day
I saw a TV show about “abstract art.” From then on,
My drawings weren’t just “I dunno,”
They were “abstract art.”

I brought this “style” of drawing to class,
I would use my free time to grab a sheet or two
Of lined paper from the bin, and for the fist time
In school, I would disobey the lines.  I drew the usual with
Colored pencils:
Shapes, focusing mainly on the pipes and circles, for I didn’t
Want the other kids to see my palm leaves
Not because I was ashamed of them, but because
They were mine.  The other kids joined in, drawing their
Own abstract art. Each was a different style, each was
Creative.
Creative. That word was thrown around by teachers
And parents alike, and it made me feel proud.
Proud that I could be positively labeled
For something that sprang from a rebellion against
The very type of people that were praising me.
Adults.
Through drawing I learned that every
Once in a while, I could gain respect by disregarding what I had been taught.
As a result of this epiphany,
I continued to draw all day, carrying myself in an
Uncharacteristically insouciant manner.

As I grew up, my abstract drawings began to fade,
I began to grow tired with my loops and pipes,
And even my palm leaves began to get old.
It didn’t help that those around me
Started to look at my work, and back at me, but this time
With a worried eye.  “Something is different with
Him.”  I could hear their thoughts in my own head.
I remember kids saying that “anyone could make that,”
Or that I should “stop doodling and focus.”
“Not anyone could make that, because I made it.”
Eventually I stopped telling myself this.
I was told by some that I should try to express my
“Creativity” in more academic and mature ways.
There was that word again.
Only this it felt like a punch in the stomach. And I
Listened to them. Why did I listen?
Abstract art proved to have a direct correlation with this
Thing called “creativity.” I guess by middle school I was supposed
To have lost it.  At what age are children expected to outgrow
Their creativity? How can creativity be defined by anyone
Other than myself?  Despite all of these questions I still have,
I rarely draw anymore.

title: "Abstract Art"

question: What does the story say about how to make contemporary art?

answer: No answer

critique: The question is asking for information that is not explicitly stated in the text.

critique: The answer should mention that the story does not mention how to make contemporary art.

critique: The story does not answer this question.

critique: Because there is no answer, the answer should state this.

question: What does the story say about the narrator's views on creativity?

answer: The narrator believes that creativity is not something that can be defined by anyone other than the creator. He believes that creativity can be expressed in many ways, not just in academic and mature ways. He thinks that creativity can be expressed through abstract art, which he thinks is a rebellion against adults. He thinks that creativity can be expressed through academic and mature ways, but he can't do that because it doesn't feel right.

critique: The last line is not necessary and not part of the narrator's views on creativity.

critique: The narrator doesn't believe that creativity can be expressed in academic and mature ways. He thinks it can be expressed in abstract art.

critique: The narrator's views on creativity are not expressed in the story.

critique: The narrator states that abstract art is a rebellion against adults, not creativity.

critique: The narrator's views are not expressed clearly.

critique: The answer makes up an unclear claim about the narrator's creativity. It also states that he thought his way of expressing creativity can only be done by abstraction, which is false as it can be expressed in many ways.

question: What does the story say about the narrator when he was a little boy?

answer: The narrator was an artistic child who liked to provoke his parents. He would draw straight lines, curved lines, and palm leaves, which he thought stood out.

critique: The narrator's parents did not like his drawings.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator was told he couldn't draw.

critique: The answer is missing the part about the narrator's desire to draw abstract art.

critique: It's omitted how the palm leaves were shaped like leaves on palm trees and how he didn't want anyone to see it or because he was ashamed of them.

critique: The answer should mention that he was told he couldn't draw.

question: What does the story say about the narrator's abstract art?

answer: The narrator used to draw abstract art when they were little. They would doodle on the kids menus in restaurants and draw on the printer when they were bored. They would also draw on lined paper in school and hide their palm leaves because they were afraid that the other kids would see them. In school, the narrator would disobey the lines and draw their abstract art. The other kids joined in, drawing their own abstract art. The narrator gained respect from their teachers and parents for their abstract art.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator's abstract art faded as he grew up.

critique: The narrator's abstract art faded as they grew older.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The narrator's abstract art was not only in restaurants and school.

critique: The ending already indicates that they stopped drawing abstract art, so there's no need to reiterate that.

critique: The response should mention that the narrator believes that abstract art has a correlation with creativity.


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BRENO GOMES GIACOMINI[1] (born September 27, 1985)[2] is an American football offensive tackle who is currently a free agent. He was drafted by the Green Bay Packers in the fifth round in the 2008 NFL Draft.[3][4] He played college football at Louisville. Giacomini is of Brazilian descent.[5] Along with Gary Barnidge of the Cleveland Browns, Giacomini founded American Football Without Barriers in 2011, a football-related charity foundation.[6]

Early years

The son of two Brazilian expatriates from Governador Valadares,[7] Giacomini was born in Cambridge, Massachusetts and raised in Malden. His interest in playing football begun as Giacomini was brought to meet New England Patriots quarterback Drew Bledsoe at the Boston Marriott, where his father worked.[8] Giacomini was a three-year starter as a defensive end and outside linebacker at Malden High School with Joe Morrisey. He started his freshman and sophomore years, but decided to not play football as a junior to concentrate on basketball, as he averaged 21.0 points per game as a senior and was second in the league in scoring. However, one of his high school football coaches convinced him to resume playing football for college.[9] Despite taking an almost two year long absence from football in high school, Giacomini was rated as a 2-star recruit by 247 Sports and a 3-star recruit by Rivals coming out of high school. Giacomini ultimately committed to play for Louisville, which was the lone Division I-A college program to offer him a scholarship.[10]

College career

Giacomini played college football at Louisville. While he had played on the defensive side of the ball in high school, the Louisville coaches were so impressed with his speed and catching ability they converted him to a tight end for his freshman and sophomore seasons.

When he reported to fall camp in 2006, he had grown from a 242-pound tight end to a 303-pound offensive tackle forcing the coaching staff to move him to the offensive line. He started two games his junior year when starter George Bussey was out with an injury.

During his senior season, Giacomini moved to starting right tackle. The team's ground game struggled, but he provided solid pass protection, allowing only four sacks and two pressures on 491 pass plays. He earned second-team All-Big East Conference honors.[11]

Professional career

Green Bay Packers

Giacomini was drafted by the Green Bay Packers in the fifth round, 150th overall, in the 2008 NFL Draft. On July 23, he was signed to a four-year rookie contract with a signing bonus of $179,000.[12][13]

Seattle Seahawks

Giacomini was acquired by the Seattle Seahawks from the Packers practice squad on September 28, 2010, and released on October 23, 2010. He was re-signed for the 2011 season, during which he played in 15 games and started 8.[14] He started every game of the 2012 season, including both postseason games.[15]

Giacomini started in 9 games during the 2013 season, missing 7 games (week 4-10) while recovering from knee surgery.[16] Giacomini started all three post-season games for the Seahawks including their 43-8 Super Bowl win over the Denver Broncos in Super Bowl XLVIII.[17]

New York Jets

Giacomini was signed by the New York Jets on March 12, 2014.[18] He started every game of the 2014 and 2015 seasons.

Giacomini started the 2016 on the Reserve/PUP list due a back injury and missed the first seven games.[19] He was activated to the active roster on October 29, 2016 prior to Week 8 of the 2016 season.[20] He was placed on injured reserve on December 13, 2016 after re-injuring his back in Week 13.[21]

On February 23, 2017, Giacomini was released by the Jets.[22]

Houston Texans

On May 16, 2017, Giacomini signed with the Houston Texans.[23]

Oakland Raiders

On March 22, 2018, Giacomini signed with the Oakland Raiders, reuniting with former Seahawks offensive line coach Tom Cable.[24] He was released on August 27, 2018.[25]

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title: Breno Giacomini

question: Summarize everything relating to injuries.

answer: Giacomini was a three-year starter in football at Malden High School. He played two seasons of college football before moving to the offensive line because he was too fat. He suffered a back injury during the 2016 season. He also injured his back in Week 13 of the 2016 season, and was released by the New York Jets. On May 16, 2017, he signed with the Houston Texans. He injured his back again in Week 13 during the 2018 preseason, and was released by the Oakland Raiders on August 27, 2018. He was put on the reserve/PUP list because of the injury.

critique: Remove the last line as it offers no new detail.

text: The first two sentences are irrelevant to the task as the information is not related to injuries.

category: coherence

question: What does the article say about the teams Giacomini has played on?

answer: Giacomini was drafted by the Green Bay Packers in the fifth round, 150th overall, in the 2008 NFL Draft. On July 23, he was signed to a four-year rookie contract with a signing bonus of $179,000. The Seattle Seahawks acquired him from the Packers practice squad on September 28, 2010, and released him on October 23, 2010. He was re-signed for the 2011 season. He started every game of the 2012 season. He started in 9 games during the 2013 season, missing 7 games while recovering from knee surgery. He was signed by the New York Jets on March 12, 2014. He started every game of the 2014 and 2015 seasons. He started the 2016 on the Reserve/PUP list due to an injury and missed the first seven games.

critique: The answer should mention that Giacomini was signed by the Houston Texans and the Oakland Raiders.

critique: The answer should mention that Giacomini signed with the Houston Texans in 2017.

question: What does the article say about Giacomini's retirement?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer can't be blank and needs to be more specific.

critique: This response was not accurate and did not integrate the answer further.

critique: The answer should mention that the article does not mention Giacomini's retirement.

critique: The answer should state that the article does not mention his retirement.

critique: The answer should mention that the article does not mention anything about his retirement.

critique: The answer should mention that the article does not mention anything about Giacomini's retirement.

critique: The answer should mention that Giacomini is still playing.


text:
Damn. Now I really didn't see this happening. Of all the things to happen at this bland school and this is the shit that happens. Wow. I guess I'm getting a bit carried, let me start from the beginning.
          My school, Jefferson Middle School, is rather boring, nothing really exciting happens here except the occasional girl drama that usally goes like, "Brian likes me! Not you, skany hoe!" And ends in a matter of three days. I'm usually quiet, if you were to call me "popular girl," you would be wrong but calling me a "nerd" wouldn't be right either. I was just sort of there. I had my friends and that's all I needed. That's where this story starts. With my friend, Daniel. Daniel was a pretty intresting boy. All acceralted classes, loved video games and comics, and wasn't bad looking at all. Over the first year of middle school, Daniel and I became pretty close. Hanging out after school and learning about eachother. It was pretty nice. Daniel loved life and he wasn't afraid to show it. If he had something to say, oh would he say it, but he was never disrespectful about it. He was always being a gentlemen. People always said shit about him.
         "Oh! Did you hear about Daniel? I heard he was sucking cock in the bathroom!"
         "Daniel the fag!"
         "Daniel should go burn in fucking hell with all the other fags that enjoy buttsex!" Get the trend here? They kept on saying he was gay, over and over. Through messages on Facebook, notes, or even writing on bathroom walls, which is very cliche. There have been times where I have asked if he was gay and I would get the same answer every time.
          "Do you think I am?" Over and over, he never changed it. Daniel was really proud and he felt as if he shouldn't state if he were gay or not and I really admire that about him. 8th grade started and I assumed that the gay jokes would have gotten old by now, but they didn't. They actual got worse. More people started calling him a "fag, dick-sucker," and spreading rumors that I don't even wanna remember. I noticed a change in Daniel, he wasn't as outgoing, didn't speak his mind, became less quite, less proud. I tried helping him, I really did but it never worked. He seemed to just become more depressed. Those kids never noticed either, they just attacked him more and more, getting more ruthless with each insult. This drama was lasting way more than three days and I wasn't sure what would happen. Shit even got worsed.
          That's when I heard the intercom come on one day during class.
       "Students, I am sad to announce that our student, Daniel Rigsbee, has died yesterday." They didn't tell us how he died, but we all knew. He killed himself. The voice of the principal announcing his death was so fucking emotionless, it made it seem as if Daniel was some character in a movie that died. Everyone was silent. I was filled with anger. Those ruthless bastards did this. They didn't know when to stop. The minute the bell rang, I sprinted to his house asking if it was true was they said today. His father simply nodded and beckoned me in. He said that there was a note left in his room directed to me and "bitches." I walked to his room, feeling as if I was going to puke. I found the note, all directed in rainbows, colors, and smiley faces. It made me sick. I opened the note with nervoness and read.
        "Dear Juno and the son of bitches at school. Let me make this clear. I am not fucking gay. I am as straight as the pole your mom dances on. I should not have to tell people this, it's my life and you shouldn't be butting in. Pun intended. You caused this and I hope you feel great. You did it! You've killed me! I'm not gonna say that this wasn't your guys' fault because fuck that. It totally was. I hope you live with that burden that you killed me for your whole life. Juno, I hope you live a great life and don't cry over me, you didn't cause this. You are amazing and don't let people do what they did to me to you. I would punch their neck. (:
                                            Bye,
                                                  Daniel-Not fucking gay-Rigsbee
        What the fuck? That wasn't sad at all. This was the Daniel that I knew. He killed himself because he was done of the shit. I don't think he felt sorry or anything. I don't even know. As I turned to leave, I found something else. It was another note reading, "I hope this was exciting enough for you, Juno. I am a coward. I wasn't gonna deal with this anymore. They didn't win, remerber that. I won. They get to deal with my death. -Daniel"
         Fucking. Daniel.

title: Uhhmm...Well I'm 13 and I would like to be a writer when I get older so here's one of my short stories. Reviews? Be honest.

question: What does the story say about bullying?

answer: The author believes bullies didn't care about Daniel and that their bullying tactics might have made Daniel commit suicide. She believes the bullies are the ones who killed her friend. She points out that the bullies were unrelenting, and the only resolution he could find was to kill himself.

critique: The first sentence is a bit confusing. It would be better to say that the author believes bullies didn't care about Daniel and that their bullying tactics might have made him commit suicide.

question: Summarize the narrator's relationship with Daniel.

answer: Juno and Daniel are best friends and have been since 8th grade. She cares deeply for him. However, she didn't notice the student body's cruelty towards him. She was angry when she heard he committed suicide.

critique: The answer should mention that Daniel is the one who committed suicide.

critique: The narrator's anger at Daniel's death is omitted.

text: Juno in fact did notice the unrelenting cruelty towards Daniel.

category: accuracy

question: Summarize the school's reaction to Daniel's death.

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the school's reaction was emotionless.

question: What does the story say about the bullies' reaction to Daniel's note?

answer: No answer

critique: The response can include the actual content of the note because it's declared to be public in the story.

critique: The response is incorrect. The story does not say anything about the bullies' reaction to Daniel's note.

critique: The response is not related to the passage.

critique: The answer should mention that the bullies did not react to the note.

critique: The answer should mention that the bullies didn't have a reaction.


text:
I walked into the bathroom and turned the shower on. As the water sprayed down and I tried to find balance between scalding and freezing, I laid back and let the water run over my midsection. The warmth of the water reminded me of that same warmth that came with being inside of a woman, and thus my dick began to rise. I groaned as I reached down and stroked myself, closing my eyes. I thought of girls of all cups and sizes, one by one entering the shower to take their turn with me. Using me like a piece of meat.

First was a wild blonde, who refused to spit out her bubble gum as she bounced up and down, beating my chest with every pump, and when she had come in my fantasy I was not quite there yet, so I exchanged her for a fair skinned brunette, who knew she wanted my member but was unsure of what she actually wanted to do with it. After moments of debate she buried her head in my lap and licked my shaft all the way up and down, gagging but not caring. Her eyes were begging for my come, and while I got closer and closer I wasn’t getting there quite as fast as she would have liked, so she beckoned a friend in to help speed things along. This friend of hers had blonde highlights streaked through her black and blue hair and a piercing just above her right nostril. Her breasts were perky and fake, full of whatever it was they put in those things. The two of them began taking turns, but quickly decided to each take a side as two tongues licked up and down, at times connecting at the tip.

Finally I could feel myself reaching that point of no return. I reared my head back and let the juices flow out of my piss hole and slide down the drain, although some drips attached themselves to the bathtub, as if all my dying children were hanging on the edge of a cliff, desperately trying not to fall into that black abyss. I opened my eyes. What a feeling! I looked around and smiled. Everything looked normal. I didn’t care about the journey and I didn’t care about the finish line. What I cared about was that I could finally stop thinking about it. I could look around and enjoy the world for what it truly was. I laid in my own filth, basking in the glory of a free mind. I noticed little things that I normally wouldn’t care about, like how clean the spots between my tiles were. I saw that I needed to buy some more soap, and that my finger nails were in dire need of a trim.

I looked up on the shower rack, and scanned the Head and Shoulders bottle, admiring the artwork on the front. It looked as if Jackson Pollock had tried using his paintbrush as a sword, swiping one big, long, curved red streak along it. Then that streak began to transform into a strand of hair, and I was reminded of a fiery redhead that practically mouth raped me in 6th grade in the back of a school bus. She was a sleek and dark red and blessed with few freckles. I fought her tongue but it always seemed to win as she penetrated my lips, sticking it as far as she could and stroking the roof of my mouth with it.

I dropped my hand at my side and felt the bath sponge in my hand. It felt like the pubic hairs of a woman who rarely waxed, and I slid my hand across it, feeling for that sweet warm pulsating spot that lies just a few more inches across the horizon. I looked over at the shower liner, and the ripples in it as it trailed across the bathtub reminded me of a beautiful sundress, which women these days just never wore. When they did, however, it was indeed beautiful and I could see just a hint of those soft, silky, milky legs that lay underneath, and knew that just beyond was the land where milk and honey met.

Once again everything I saw, felt and sensed reminded me of that devilish, curvy template of a body I could not resist.

Once again my glasses were covered in rose-colored lipstick.

Once again I lost my free, clear mind.

Once again I was hard.

Well, it was nice while it lasted.

title: American Girls: I am Whitesnake, Hear Me Roar

question: Summarize the main context of this story.

answer: The protagonist is masturbating in the shower and daydreaming about sex. He imagines a variety of sexual situations that cum to him and flows from there. The narrator compliments on their living room, bathroom, and soap and thinks about what feels like breasts and pubic hairs.

critique: The model does not mention that the narrator is a man.

critique: "The protagonist is masturbating in the shower and daydreaming about sex. He imagines a variety of sexual situations that cum to him and flows from there." - this is incorrect. The protagonist is not masturbating, he's just thinking about his fantasies.

critique: The answer should mention the protagonist's fantasy about the fiery redhead.

critique: The last sentence is inaccurate. The story doesn't mention anything about soap or breasts.

critique: The protagonist does not admire their living room, bathroom, or soap.

critique: The narrator is not complimenting the living room, bathroom, or soap.

critique: The answer omits an important part of the story. It should mention the fetish that the narrator has.

critique: The answer misses to points about the story's main context, which are the narrator's thoughts about his fantasies and the women that come to mind.

critique: The response is missing details about the story.

critique: It is incorrect that the narrator is masturbating in his living room.

text: The answer should mention the key detail of the narrator's post-orgasm clarity and how fleeting that clarity is.

category: coverage

refinement: The protagonist is masturbating in the shower and daydreaming about sex. He imagines a variety of sexual situations that cum to him and flows from there. The narrator compliments on their living room, bathroom, and soap and thinks about what feels like breasts and pubic hairs.

question: Summarize what mattered the most to the main character in the story.

answer: The narrator was always trying to escape or dissociate himself from his thoughts. Bathroom activities provided a distraction for his mind to chew on and allowed him to be content for some time. The subject of his fantasies usually had to do with women, but he didn't care who the women were during them. The focus naturally fell to the physical aspects of what being in this moment would be like. Anything (including the state of his bathroom) that reminded him of the women he was fantasizing about sent him back into the fantasies. Things were happening but the narrator couldn't really focus on them. The materialistic details of the bathroom could provide distraction in the form of oasis but once he pushed the thoughts of stimulation aside, his mind would get back to the fantasies that he was trying to escape.

critique: Some of this is not correct or incorrect and should be reevaluated before being included.

critique: The answer is not a summary of the story. It's a summary of the narrator's thoughts.

critique: The narrator's thoughts were not always about women.

critique: The response needs to be written in a more cohesive way.

critique: This answer is not related to the story and is made up. It should be omitted.

critique: The response is not clear and does not make sense

critique: The answer is not clear and is not a summary of the story.

critique: "The materialistic details of the bathroom could provide distraction in the form of oasis but once he pushed the thoughts of stimulation aside, his mind would get back to the fantasies that he was trying to escape." - this sentence is incoherent.

critique: The second sentence is redundant. Nowhere did the narrator explain that bathroom activities provided a distraction for him. The first part of the second sentence describes the best an empty description could describe. I'd delete the last sentence because it does nothing but confusing the reader. The fifth and sixth sentences rewrite the same idea using better, simpler wording. Finally, the last two sentences are grammatically flawed. I'd add one detail about the main interest of the main character - how anything reminds him of that devilish, curvy template of a body.

critique: It's omitted that the narrator was always trying to escape or dissociate himself from his thoughts.

critique: There were distracting thoughts even when bathing (which could be called an oasis)

critique: It is not clear that the narrator was trying to escape his thoughts.

critique: "The subject of his fantasies usually had to do with women, but he didn't care who the women were during them." - this is inaccurate, as the narrator was comparing the women he was with the women he was with.

text: This is incorrect; what matters the most to the narrator is that brief moment of clarity he gets when he is not distracted by sexual thoughts.

refinement: The narrator was always trying to escape or dissociate himself from his thoughts. Bathroom activities provided a distraction for his mind to chew on and allowed him to be content for some time. The subject of his fantasies usually had to do with women, but he didn't care who the women were during them. The focus naturally fell to the physical aspects of what being in this moment would be like. Anything (including the state of his bathroom) that reminded him of the women he was fantasizing about sent him back into the fantasies. Things were happening but the narrator couldn't really focus on them. The materialistic details of the bathroom could provide distraction in the form of oasis but once he pushed the thoughts of stimulation aside, his mind would get back to the fantasies that he was trying to escape.

question: Does the main character seem to have a problem with dreaming about sexual fantasies?

answer: Yes, he had a fantasy of sex with a blonde girl followed by a fantasy of a brunette girl. But his real mind was free when he is naked in the bathtub. When he imagined seeing soap, mirrors, and the shower liner, he was remembering the bodies of women and masturbated again.

critique: The answer is difficult to understand and doesn't really answer the question.

critique: The "Yes" is the wrong answer. It should be "No".

critique: "When he imagined seeing soap, mirrors, and the shower liner, he was remembering the bodies of women and masturbated again." - this is not stated in the text and is incoherent. The model should delete this.

critique: There's no evidence that he was "free" when he was naked in the bathtub, only that he could enjoy the world for what it truly is.

critique: The answer is not clear and needs to be re-written.

critique: The answer misses to mention the girls' names.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: "When he imagined seeing soap, mirrors, and the shower liner, he was remembering the bodies of women and masturbated again." - kind of just repeats itself to the question. Delete everything after smearing the details they only make it worse.

critique: The first two sentences do not make any sense

critique: The answer is incorrect on many levels. The narrator fantasizes about numerous women and not just one girl.

critique: The response is not a summary of the passage.


text:
You have an idea you want to turn into a business. You're excited. You're driven. You have a dream.

But ideas, excitement, drive and your dream will only take you so far. Here are six questions you MUST ask yourself before you start your business.

Watch on YouTube here: HTTPS://YOUTU.BE/Q3SAVRH2LYC

Most of the time, when people think about being a business owner, they think about flashy cars, money, yachts, money, freedom, money… you get the idea.

What most people don't think about is everything that goes into starting a business. The long hours, the lack of money, the sacrifices, and the hard work.

Ideas are meaningless without hard work. Everyone has ideas, thousands a day, and 99.99% of people do nothing with them.

But…!

If you're one of those people who takes action… if you're willing to put in the work… if you're prepared to do whatever it takes…

Then here are…

6 Questions You MUST Ask Yourself Before Starting a Business

_1: What Problem Will I Solve?_

One of the most important questions you need to ask is

  “What problem will I solve?”

If you cannot answer that question, you will struggle.

The problem can be small or large. The problem could be as simple as people want to buy hand made, custom greeting cards, but they can't find any. That's the problem my mother-in-law solves.

Solve one problem, and be the best at solving it, and you'll be able to start your business.

_2: Who Has This Problem? Who Needs My Business?_

After you know what problem your business will solve, you need to know who has that problem. You'll want to know how many people have it, who they are, and where you can find them.

My recommended tool for answering those questions is THE IDEAL CLIENT AVATAR WORKSHEET FOUND HERE.

If you follow the worksheet and answer all of the questions, you'll know who has your problem, what they buy, why they have the problem and all sorts of other information that you can use to market your solution to them.

_3: Why Do I Care?_

If you don’t care about your business, no one else will either. If you're going to start a business, you must care about the problem, the people who have it, and your solution.

I started my business coaching business because I couldn't stand the idea of people being miserable every morning before they went to a job they hated or that they didn't like. Though the memory is fading, I still remember the anxiety and nausea I felt as I stood over my work computer and logged in.

I never want people to feel like I did. And, I want to show people there's a better way to live life.

_4: How will the lives of my customers be better after doing business with me?_

If you're in business just to make money, you'll fail. There has to be something deeper, something more meaningful if you want to succeed. And, that often centers around making the lives of your customers and clients better.

Obviously, unless you're a sociopath, you don't want to make the lives of your clients worse. But making people happy might not be what you think of when you think about starting a business.

If you start a restaurant, you might make their life better by filling your clients' stomachs with healthy and delicious food. If you're an accountant, you might not just want to help people file their taxes, but to save money or get a larger return too.

_How will your clients be better after they buy from you? How can you go above and beyond what's expected and deliver an experience that brings joy?_

_5: What Am I Willing to Sacrifice to Make My Dream a Reality?_

The other day, one of my mastermind clients told me that he never really understood what sacrifice meant. He said that he “got the concept,” but hadn't really experienced it until he started his business.

Before starting a business, make a list of everything you do in a week. Don't just list your activities for a day, but try to log everything you do in a typical seven day period.

After you've done that, make a second list of things that you're willing to give up, stop doing, or could live without while you build your business. Starting a business will cost more time, money, energy, friendships, and resources than you think it will, and you WILL have to make sacrifices.

To be honest, not all of my clients leave my coaching and mastermind program with a business. The people who don't leave the program with a clear path forward often see the things they'll have to sacrifice and grab onto them instead of letting them go.

They decide their dream of starting a business is not worth the hard work and sacrifices it will take to make that dream a reality.

And, also honestly, that's 100% okay.

For me to become a really great golfer, I'd have to spend money on lessons, practice several times a week, and say no to other fun things that I'd like to do. So I just play bad golf. Starting a business is the same way; some people would just rather do other things.

_6: Why Haven't I Started Yet?_

Ok, finally, if you've answered all of the other questions, there's only one left.

If you know the problem you're going to solve, and you know who has the problem you're solving and where you can find them…

If you're clear on what motivates you to fix this problem and you know how you're going to make the world a better place with your product…

And you understand the amount of effort, energy and sacrifice that it will take to get started and to keep going…

The only question that's left is: _Why haven't you started yet!?_

question: What does the text say about ideas?

answer: The text says that ideas are meaningless without hard work. Everyone has ideas, thousands a day, and 99.99% of people do nothing with them.

critique: This is a tautology that's better expressed as its own sentence.

critique: The answer should mention that ideas are only the start of a business.

critique: The answer should mention that ideas are important.

critique: The text also says that ideas are meaningless without hard work.

critique: The text also provides some more information about ideas.

critique: The answer should mention the six questions.

critique: The text doesn't say that ideas are meaningless without hard work. It says that ideas are meaningless without hard work.

question: What does the text say about problems?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention the importance of problems.

critique: The response misses to answer the question.

critique: The answer should mention that problems are an important question to ask before starting a business.

critique: The answer should be that a problem needs to be solved.

critique: The article is about starting businesses, so the answer should cover that topic.

text: It is omitted that questions you must ask yourself before starting a business are: What problem will I solve?  Who has this problem? Why do I care about the problem? How will the lives of my customers be better after doing business with me? What Am I Willing to Sacrifice to Make My Dream a Reality? Why Haven't I Started Yet?

question: Summarize how a business owner can make the lives of their clients better?

answer: The author suggests that a business owner can make the lives of their clients better by filling their stomachs with healthy and delicious food, or by helping people file their taxes and save money or get a larger return.

critique: The answer should mention that the author is talking about a hypothetical situation.

critique: The answer omits that a business owner can also make the lives of their clients better by delivering an experience that brings joy.

critique: The answer should mention that the author is talking about a restaurant and an accountant.

critique: The answer omits that the business owner can make the lives of their clients better by delivering an experience that brings joy.

critique: The answer makes incorrect inferences based on the original text.

critique: The answer omits the other ways a business owner can make the lives of their clients better.

critique: The response misses to mention that the business owner can go above and beyond what is expected and deliver an experience that brings joy.

question: What does the text say about business loans?

answer: No answer

critique: The question asks for information that isn't present in the text.

critique: The text does not mention business loans.


text:
[How to Choose a 3PL Logistics Provider (Top 5 Factors)]
Selecting the right LOGISTICS SERVICE PROVIDER can be a tough experience for companies. Don’t shortcut the process though, because the reputation and success of your company may soon depend on your logistics provider’s reliability.

Avoid a potential logistics nightmare by using these 5 elements in selecting your perfect logistics provider (such as a third-party logistics company, or “3PL”).

1. CAPABILITIES

A prospective logistics provider must be competent in the specific service areas that meet your company’s needs. Just because a provider is a rock star in one area, it’s not a forgone conclusion that they can service your firm properly.

Also, they should have a set of abilities that can satisfy your both your short-term and future requirements. For instance, EDI-capability may not be a requirement for you today, but what if it does become required for you in 12-24 months? Do you really want to unwind all the onboarding and integration work invested in a new relationship? Dig a little deeper and ask:

-   Are truckload lanes repetitive, originating from a limited number of shipping points and terminating to a relatively limited number of consignees?
-   Are shipments time-sensitive and/or do they require drop trailers? A mid-sized, asset-based carrier would meet these needs without getting sidetracked by their exceedingly large list of clients.
-   Are truckload lanes sporadic? Is there live loading/unloading or do shipments come from a high number of origins that terminate to a high number of receivers? If so, a 3PL provider or broker might be a better fit.
-   Do you require access to dedicated trucking assets and 3PL? A logistics provider that possesses both assets and a 3PL division may be able to offer optimal solutions.

If a provider claims to possess all the capabilities “under the sun” but your organization requires only a few core services… be wary of a company that is a “jack of all trades” and master of none.

2. CUSTOMER SERVICE

Does the logistics provider prioritize customer service, responsiveness, fluid lines of communication and effective problem solving? These elements can be difficult to ascertain early on but do your homework.

Virtually all companies claim to have excellent customer service, but how do you know? You ask their customers. Ask for references, preferably from companies in similar industries and needs. Good customer service is no accident. If the customer service is consistently excellent, it’s likely a result of a well-documented and repeated process that will continue over the years.

[Find a Logistic Provider with a Great Safety Rating]Another yield of good process execution is safety. It is uncommon for a logistics provider to achieve excellent results in customer service and poor results in safety or vice versa. It can be deduced that a safe logistics provider, probably provides good customer service.

3. SAFETY RECORD

Due to the ever-changing landscape of safety regulations, it is imperative that you select a carrier with a strong safety record. A review of safety ratings and statistics is available to the public here. Also, see how we value safety.

4. COMPANY STABILITY

Whether your supply chain is simple or complex, select a logistics provider with overall company stability. Top suppliers are consistent suppliers. Quality can be jeopardized as companies experience rapid change. How long has the company been around? (Since 1958, we’ve been saving time and money for our customers with logistics services.)

Furthermore, if one high-liability event occurs and your provider cannot withstand the fallout, the liability often shifts, in effect, to you the shipper. This concern can be eased if the provider’s “word”, name and reputation has remained intact through decades of market turbulence and economic uncertainty.

5. COMPANY REPUTATION

In a new business arrangement, you can rest assured that at some point the relationship will be tested. Often it as at this juncture, that the character of the service provider’s leadership will be revealed.

Before it is too late, investigate whether the provider is likely to respond with integrity and honor. Time will reveal whether the firm has a good, bad or ugly reputation with customers, suppliers, and employees.

-   How do they treat their suppliers and employees?
-   Are they an active and positive force within their community?
-   What type of reviews do they have online?
-   What are the consistent themes that appear again and again in their marketing material?
-   How long have they been in business?

The answers will go a long way to determining how the provider will be as a supplier and partner.

BONUS: Double-check all elements if a supplier’s price is significantly lower than the market.

-   What good is a cheap price if a provider doesn’t deliver consistently or provide an adequate response in the event of mishap?
-   What good is a cheap price if service failures cause you to lose revenue?
-   What good is a cheap price if your team spends countless hours resolving claims and problems?

Think about _THE TOTAL COST_ associated with selecting a long-term solution provider. The provider that offers you the overall lowest cost of working together is the partner you want around for years to come.

As we’ve discussed, finding the right logistics provider can be a daunting task. Use these 5 elements to narrow the field of applicants. We’ve been providing logistics services in the USA since 1958 and would be happy to figure out how we can help you improve your business. CONTACT US TO GET STARTED!

ABOUT BR WILLIAMS:

With humble beginnings back in 1958, BR Williams has grown into an award-winning supply chain management company servicing all 48 contiguous states and Canada. With facilities in Mobile AL; Piedmont, AL; Tallahassee, FL; Anniston, AL (two facilities); Eastaboga, AL; and Oxford, AL, B.R. Williams’ distribution network supports over 50 customers and another 2,550 in the Trucking and Logistics divisions. Industries served include the following: automotive, defense, home improvement, education, food raw materials, textiles, chemical, industrial packaging, metals (finished goods), highway safety and more.

TO DISCUSS YOUR DISTRIBUTION, LOGISTICS, OR TRANSPORTATION SERVICES OPTIONS, PLEASE CONTACT US ONLINE OR CALL (800) 523-7963

question: What does the text say about how to choose a logistics provider?

answer: Start off your search by choosing only a logistics provider that meets the minimum necessities. It's okay to think of your company's needs first, so it helps to create a list of the core services, then identify the ones that meet your company's expectations at the moment. That way, if you don't need something particular at the moment, you won't have to go through transitional phases in a new relationship.

critique: The answer misrepresents what is said in the article.

critique: "Start off your search by choosing only a logistics provider that meets the minimum necessities. It's okay to think of your company's needs first, so it helps to create a list of the core services, then identify the ones that meet your company's expectations at the moment. That way, if you don't need something particular at the moment, you won't have to go through transitional phases in a new relationship." - this is not what the text says. The text says to avoid shortcuts and to use these 5 elements in selecting your perfect logistics provider.

critique: This is not what the text says. The text says to make sure the logistics provider has the necessary capabilities, to check their customer service, and to ensure they have a good record of safety.

critique: The answer is not related to the question.

critique: The last two sentences are not relevant.

critique: The answer does not mention the five elements of selecting a logistics provider.

critique: The response does not cover the whole of all the points included in the original, so it should be fixed.

critique: The answer is mostly accurate, but it would be a lot easier to understand if it used the same language and defined terminology.

critique: The response did not answer the question.

critique: The text does not mention anything about 'minimum necessities' but rather the core services.

question: What does the text say about BR Williams?

answer: With humble beginnings back in 1958, BR Williams has grown into an award-winning supply chain management company servicing all 48 contiguous states and Canada. They have facilities in Mobile AL; Piedmont, AL; Tallahassee, FL; Anniston, AL (two facilities); Eastaboga, AL; and Oxford, AL. B.R. Williams’ distribution network supports over 50 customers and 2,550, in the Trucking and Logistics divisions.

critique: It is omitted that they have been in business for 50 years and have over 2,550 customers.

critique: There is no evidence that B.R. Williams' Network supports over 50 customers.

critique: The answer should mention their reputation.

critique: The answer does not give a clear idea of what BR Williams does. 'B.R. Williams’ distribution network supports over 50 customers and 2,550, in the Trucking and Logistics divisions' is not very clear for a prospective buyer. It would be better to mention the kind of customer or industry that BR Williams serves.

critique: The answer does not mention their trucking and logistics divisions.

critique: The answer should mention the company's reputation.

critique: How long B.R. Williams has been around isn't important information to the question. That should be omitted.

critique: The answer should mention the awards they've won.

critique: Doesn't mention their service offerings.

critique: This is a list of city names, not facilities.

critique: The answer should mention their services.

critique: The answer omits the fact that BR Williams is a logistics provider.

critique: The answer should mention the awards the company has won.

critique: The answer should mention the awards they have won.

question: What does the text say about the BR Williams' prices?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer could be inferred from the text as it is mentioned that BR Williams' prices are significantly lower than the market.

critique: There is not enough information to answer.

critique: There is no clarity on BR Williams' prices in the text.

critique: The answer should at least mention BR Williams' prices before concluding that the question is not answered.

critique: The lack of a price from the company decreases the answers ability to give a good answer.


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[Home in Miami County] JOHN JOHNSTON was an Indian agent in the United States Northwest Territory. He was born on 25 March 1775 near Ballyshannon in the north of Ireland. His father was Scottish and his mother was a Huguenot. He left Ireland when he was eleven years old, travelling to America with a priest and a trusted family friend who was also his tutor. When he emigrated to Pennsylvania in 1786, his father, mother, four brothers, and one sister remained in Ireland.[1] They came to America five years after he settled here.

Johnston's career with Native Americans started as a wagoner for General Anthony Wayne's Legion of the United States.[2] He returned to Pennsylvania after the campaign and worked as a law clerk. At age 27, Johnston met Rachel Robinson, who was 16. They eloped to Lancaster, Ohio and were married on 15 July 1802. They had 15 children - the first 4 were the first all-white children to be born at Ft. Wayne (now Fort Wayne, Indiana). 14 of their 15 children lived into adulthood.[3]

In 1802, President Thomas Jefferson appointed Johnston as Indian Agent at the new trading agency in Fort Wayne, and by 1809 he was in charge of two Indian Agencies.[4] His primary responsibility was to manage trade so that Indians in the area would not seek trade with the nearby British. Johnston was responsible to the territorial governor, William Henry Harrison, and to the Superintendent of Indian Trade. Almost immediately, however, a rivalry began between Johnston and William Wells, the official interpreter at Fort Wayne. The Miami of Fort Wayne trusted Wells, who had been adopted into their tribe, while U.S. government officials questioned Wells' loyalty and sided with Johnston.[5] Johnston remained at Fort Wayne through a period of growing resentment between the American Indians and the United States,[6] and filed a report summarizing Indian accounts of the Battle of Tippecanoe in 1811.[7]

That same year, an Indian agency was established at Piqua, Ohio, and Johnston asked to be transferred to the new agency. He was at this agency during the War of 1812, and organized a Shawnee party under Captain Logan to rescue women and children during the Siege of Fort Wayne, where his brother, Stephen, was killed.[8] He had much better relations with the local Shawnee and Wyandot than he had with the Indians at Fort Wayne, and served as Indian Agent until 1829. He helped negotiate the Treaty of Upper Sandusky in 1842, which removed the Wyandot from Ohio to the West.[9] It was reported that he earned a $1200.00 salary per year as an agent, and he retained that position until let go by President Jackson - a total of thirty-one years.[10]

Johnston was a Whig, and in 1844 was one of Ohio's delegates to the Whig Party's national convention. After the convention, he travelled to campaign for Henry Clay.

Besides his duties as an Indian agent, he also contributed to many other facets of Ohio. He was a canal commissioner with Ohio for eleven years, president of the historical and philosophical societies in Ohio, and founder of the first Sunday school in Miami County, Ohio.[11] John Johnston was also founder of Kenyon College, served on the board of trustees of Miami University, and was a member of the board at West Point.[12] He wrote _Indian Tribes in Ohio_[13] before he died in 1861 in Washington, D.C. Today, his Piqua farm maintained by the Ohio Historical Society.

John and Rachel Johnston were married for 38 years before his wife died on 24 July 1840, after eleven days of illness. The bereavement after the death of his wife in the family home, caused him to leave and move to Cincinnati with a daughter, and then later to Dayton, where he died in 1861 at the age of 86.[14]

Notes

[1] History of Miami County Ohio - Col. John Johnston. Piqua Public Library (3 Files)

[2] Thornbrough, 12

[3] Johnston Farm Ohio

[4]

[5]

[6] Burnhart, pg 375-378

[7] Burnhart, pg 391, fn 38

[8] Shelby County History, link below

[9] Ohio Historical Society

[10]

[11]

[12] Ohio History Central, link below

[13] Hill, 1957

[14]

title: John Johnston (Indian agent)

question: What does the text say about Johnston's personal life?

answer: John Johnston was an Indian agent in the United States Northwest Territory. He was born on March 25, 1775 in Ireland, and his father was Scottish, his mother was a Huguenot. John left Ireland when he was 11 years old, traveling to America with a priest and a trusted family friend who was also his tutor. He emigrated to Pennsylvania in 1786. Johnston was married to Rachel Robinson, who was 16 when they met. They had 15 children, including four all-white children, who were the first to be born at Fort Wayne, Indiana. Johnston was a Whig, and in 1844 was one of Ohio's delegates to the Whig Party's national convention. Johnston's wife, Rachel, died in 1840, eleven days after an illness. After her death, Johnston left and moved to Cincinnati with a daughter, and then to Dayton, where he died in 1861 at the age of 86.

critique: Include that Johnston was an Indian agent

critique: Johnston's wife died in 1840, eleven days after an illness.

critique: The answer is not direct enough in its response to the question.

critique: The answer is more about Johnston's career than his personal life.

question: What does the text say about Johnston's work at Fort Wayne?

answer: Johnston's career with Native Americans started as a wagoner for General Anthony Wayne's Legion of the United States. He returned to Pennsylvania after the campaign and worked as a law clerk. At age 27, Johnston met Rachel Robinson, who was 16. They eloped to Lancaster, Ohio and were married on 15 July 1802. They had 15 children - the first 4 were the first all-white children to be born at Ft. Wayne (now Fort Wayne, Indiana). Johnston was appointed as Indian Agent at the new trading agency in Fort Wayne in 1802. Almost immediately, however, a rivalry broke out between Johnston and William Wells, the official interpreter at Fort Wayne, who had been adopted into the Miami of Fort Wayne tribe. The Miami of Fort Wayne trusted Wells, who had been adopted into their tribe, while US government officials questioned Wells' loyalty and sided with Johnston. Johnston remained at Fort Wayne through a period of growing resentment between the American Indians and the United States. He filed a report summarizing Indian accounts of the Battle of Tippecanoe in 1811.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The answer does not depict the animosity between Johnston and Wells.

critique: The answer should mention Johnston's work at Fort Wayne.

critique: Johnston's wife and children are irrelevant.

critique: The response should include that Johnston was responsible to the territorial governor, William Henry Harrison, and to the Superintendent of Indian Trade. Almost immediately, however, a rivalry began between Johnston and William Wells, the official interpreter at Fort Wayne. The Miami of Fort Wayne trusted Wells, who had been adopted into their tribe, while U.S. government officials questioned Wells' loyalty and sided with Johnston. Johnston remained at Fort Wayne through a period of growing resentment between the American Indians and the United States

question: What does the text say about Johnston's cause of death?

answer: He died in Washington D.C., Ohio in 1861. It was reported that he worked as agent for the U.S. government for about 31 years. He is responsible for setting up many agencies that managed trade for the Indians. John Johnston was also a CanalCommissioner. He also served on the board of trustees of Miami University and West Point. He was a delegate to the Whig Party's national convention in 1844. John Johnston was also a founder of Kenyon College in Ohio.

critique: Johnston died after his wife died in 1840, which he attributed to her loss.

critique: The response is missing the cause of Johnston's death.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The answer is irrelevant to the question.

critique: Johnston's cause of death is not discussed in the text.


text:
Last Stop

Sweat begins to drip down Reznov’s face as the countryside of his homeland rushes by his window. He knows what’s coming up and it’s a necessity that he maintains his composure yet his heart starts to palpitate and palms become clammy as the border crossing gets closer and closer. He’s confused and taken back by his anxious state. He’s forgotten the first rule in his line of work; maintain a calm state of mind and under no circumstances …break… character. This directly leads into rule number two; don’t, get, caught. Then again this time it isn’t really work. He’s not pretending anymore, not adopting a new character when he arrives at his destination nor are there any contacts to help…this time it’s just him. This time it’s personal. No more fake IDs and passports and most importantly no more help from Shinra Headquarters.

Shinra Headquarters. He shudders at the thought of his old place of work. What he believed in, what he worked for, what he fought for, what he lived for, and yet, the whole reason why he’s fleeing. He thinks back on what caused him to turn his back on his homeland, never to return, to effectively run from his country and kin and seek refuge in ‘enemy’ territory. All of his life he thought he was fighting for the right reasons. He’s seen so much now that he doesn’t know what to think. Was everything he believed in and dedicated his life for a lie? All propaganda from a totalitarian and fascist government that he himself worked for and gathered intel for and worst still…believed in. It’s like his whole world has been tipped upside down since he broke free from that world of despair and oppressive tyranny. He still can’t believe that he couldn’t see what kind of world he was living in worse yet working for. Not until now.  Peace sells…but who’s buying? They tried to control everything, control people to the point of oppression, control food, control luxury items, control thought, control free speech. Control freedom. It’s like the harder you squeeze your fist the more easily people will see cracks between your fingers like he did. He finally realised that the people and government he was working for and had once believed in was incompatible with his morals.

As he thinks this he is disrupted by the chime of a the train announcement; “Last stop coming up; The International border crossing at Safia” .

His stomach drops and he feels as though he’s just gone over the crest of a steep rollercoaster experiencing negative gravity. He turns pale, shudders as if someone had poured ice cold water down his back. Then Reznov feels unbearably ill. He takes several deep breaths trying to keep calm and collected. He reflects on  past missions he has completed - hundreds of dangerous and risky operations, with many involving tricky border crossings, even been in life threatening situations several times and he’s done this all without batting an eyelid. Yet now that has been backed into fleeing and he is a mess. He’s meant to be a professional yet right now he’s acting like an amateur, with nerves worse than the first day on the job. Not calm or confident in his expert ability. He’s mouth feels full of cotton wool and his throat dry.

Suddenly he hears foot steps behind him. This is it he thinks. It’s over. Well I’m not going out without a fight he mutters as he mentally prepares himself. The footsteps get closer. His fight or flight response kicks in and there’s an adrenalin surge throughout his body. He has the look of a prepared killer in is mako green eyes and he is ready. He feels a hand on his shoulder.

“Excuse me, sir...”

He grabs the hand and pins the person against the wall of the train violently. To his horror he sees a petrified young female train attendant. What has he done how could he do this he thinks.

“S..sorry” Reznov stutters then he runs to the restroom.

He slams closed the door, puts his hands against the sink and looks at himself in the mirror dripping in sweat still feeling unbearably ill.

He was ready to kill that poor young train attendant without so much as a second thought, thank god he didn’t he thinks. He splashes water on his face as deeply exhales; he doesn’t know what to do now. He’s questioning his ability, wondering if it’s worth it, wondering if he’ll even make it. He’s lost.

“This is your driver speaking, we are 5 minutes away from the international border crossing have your RFID chips and registration ready, thank you for traveling skyline railway have a safe trip”

He can’t do this he thinks. He looks in his front pocket at his last resort. The last line of defence for any Shinra covert agent. Cyanide. He takes out his forged registration and looks at where the RFID chip he made and programed was in his arm. In his right hand is his registration. In his left hand is a cyanide pill. Possible freedom. Or instant escape. He hears the train screech on the breaks as they arrive at their last stop. It’s time to decide…

title: Last Stop (Short story I wrote for school feedback is appreciated)

question: What does the text tell us about Shinra?

answer: The organization presumably has many operatives who are sent out on dangerous covert missions without warning, as the protagonist considered himself to be ready to fight to the death beforehand. It's implied they're somewhere in the Middle East. The agency is monitored and headquarters are divided according to regional control of a country. Alternatively, it's possible that Shinra is a government agency in a fictional Middle East country, as they have complete control over what is going on internally - they could judge people when they handed in their cyanide vial, which are called 'RFID chips.'

critique: The response contains inaccurate information.

critique: The answer is mostly made up. The only thing that is true is that the protagonist is a part of Shinra.

critique: The answer should mention that the protagonist is a former agent who is fleeing his country.

text: RFID chips are not cyanide, those are two separate things.

question: Summarize Reznov's reasons for leaving his country.

answer: Reznov is a secret agent for Shinra. He has been working for them for years, but he has realized that the government he has been working for is incompatible with his morals. He has seen too much and realized that the government is totalitarian and fascist. He is fleeing the country to seek refuge in enemy territory.

critique: The answer should mention that he has realized that the government is totalitarian and fascist.

critique: The answer should mention that he is fleeing his country because he believes the government is totalitarian and fascist.

critique: It is omitted why he is seeking refuge in enemy territory.

critique: The answer should mention that he is fleeing his country because he believes the government is incompatible with his morals.

question: What does the text tell us about Reznov's home country?

answer: It seems that Reznov's home country is run by a fascist government of control, that it is totalitarian. They tried to control everything and everyone, attempting to control thought, free speech, and food and luxury items. The country is described as evil and oppressive.

critique: The country is described as totalitarian, not evil.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

question: What does the text tell us about Reznov's friends and family?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer is incorrect. The text should state that the text doesn't mention anything about his friends and family.

critique: The answer should mention that the text does not mention anything about his friends and family.

critique: There's no answer or question related to the subject.

critique: The text does not mention anything about his friends and family.

critique: The text does not explicitly mention any of his friends or family, but it does mention that he is fleeing his country and kin.


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RUSTAM ABDULLAH SANI (12 August 1944[1] – 23 April 2008) was a Malaysian politician, sociologist and political scientist. He was of Minangkabau descent from Salido, West Sumatera.

Born towards the end of the Japanese occupation of Malaya in the Perak border town of Tanjung Malim, Rustam grew up in the shadow of his famous father, Abdullah Sani, who was better known as Ahmad Boestaman. Boestaman was a Malay nationalist and the founder of political parties Angkatan Pemuda Insaf and Parti Rakyat.

Rustam served as an associate professor at Universiti Kebangsaan Malaysia, Universiti Malaya and was a prolific writer in Malay and English. His anthology of poems, Riak-Riak Kecil, composed in 1977, was published by Dewan Bahasa dan Pustaka. Rustam won the National Literature Award for 1988/89.[2]

Education

Rustam attended the Victoria Institution in Kuala Lumpur.[3] He later enrolled at the University of Malaya for a bachelor's degree before heading to the University of Kent for a master's degree, where he wrote a thesis entitled _Social Roots of the Malay_ Left which traced the origin of the Malay political left to the 1920s.[4] At Kent, he mentored a variety of undergraduates including PAS secretary-general Kamaruddin Jaffar, economist Ghazali Atan and publisher Lim Siang Jin.

Early career

Rustam joined the Universiti Kebangsaan Malaysia economics faculty in early 1977, then still at its temporary campus in Lembah Pantai, Kuala Lumpur. It was here he befriended with many personalities such as Jomo Kwame Sundaram, Sanusi Osman, Ting Chew Peh and Shamsul Amri. He deepened his preoccupation with the challenges of Malaysian nationhood at the university, an enduring theme in his writings since the 1970s, and the subject of one of his two latest books, which was launched posthumously by his old friend from the 1960s, Anwar Ibrahim.

Later he embarked for Yale University, but after passing the tough comprehensive exams there, he lost interest, preferring instead to write a statistics textbook. Back at UKM, he switched to the Politics Department as his old Canterbury friend, then Abim secretary-general Kamaruddin, had left to join Anwar in the United Malays National Organisation (UMNO) and the Government.

With Syed Husin at the helm of the Malaysian Social Science Association (PSSM), Rustam started a bilingual quarterly journal, Ilmu Masyarakat, to try to open new Malaysian debates under the dispensation of the then new Prime Minister Datuk Seri Dr Mahathir Mohamad, to which the former UKM academic as well as PNB and Guthrie chief executive Tan Sri Khalid Ibrahim (later Selangor Mentri Besar) was an early and insightful contributor.

At the end of the 1980s, Rustam accepted Nordin Sopiee’s invitation to join ISIS. There, he helped to craft Mahathir’s historic February 1991 speech promising a “Bangsa Malaysia” as part of his Vision 2020 (thankfully translated by Rustam as Wawasan 2020, instead of the earlier Visi 2020), changing the terms of national discourse in one fell swoop.

Frustrated by its lack of serious commitment, he left ISIS in the mid-1990s to become a writer, translator and reluctant businessman.

Soon after, he agreed to become deputy president of PSSM, later inaugurating the biennial series of international Malaysian Studies Conferences in which we tried to reposition Malaysian studies as a national – and nationalist – discourse, rather than as post-colonial studies.

Political involvement

However, the events of 1997-99 with the sacking of the then Deputy Prime Minister Anwar Ibrahim disrupted Rustam's plans and he rose to the popular national call for _Reformasi_ following Anwar’s incarceration and persecution, becoming its most thoughtful “participant observer”.

As deputy president of the Parti Rakyat Malaysia, a party his father had founded almost half a century before, he negotiated its principled unification with the political movement which had emerged around Anwar despite several high-profile defections. After the merger with Parti Keadilan Nasional to become the Parti Keadilan Rakyat (PKR), he became PKR information chief.

Death

Rustam died at his home in Gombak, Selangor on 23 April 2008 at the age of 64 due to respiratory difficulties.[5] His body was sent to a mosque near his house at Bukit Lela and he was later buried at the Taman Danau Kota Muslim cemetery after Zohor prayers.

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title: Rustam Sani

question: What was the subject matter of one of the two latest published books that Rustam wrote and when were they published?

answer: The subject matter of one of the two latest published books that Rustam wrote was the challenges of Malaysian nationhood. The book was published in the 1970s.

critique: There is no evidence that the book was published in the 1970s.

critique: This answer is completely wrong. It needs to be completely rewritten.

critique: This answer is false. It was published in the 1980s.

question: What part did Rastum play in the Malaysian Social Science Association?

answer: He started a bilingual quarterly journal, Ilmu Masyarakat, to try to open new Malaysian debates under the dispensation of the then new Prime Minister Datuk Seri Dr Mahathir Mohamad.

critique: The answer should mention his role as deputy president.

critique: Doesn't mention his role as deputy president.

critique: The answer omits that he was deputy president of PSSM.

question: Why did Rastum lose interest in his studies at Yale

answer: He preferred to write a statistics textbook.

critique: This does not adequately answer the question.

critique: The answer should be more specific about what he lost interest in.

critique: The answer should mention that he lost interest in his studies at Yale.

critique: While this is true, it is not the reason he lost interest in his studies at Yale.


text:
[Walmart set to snap up Flipkart; But e-comm war far from over]

__ Walmart set to snap up Flipkart; But e-comm war far from over

The moment is upon us. India is the new battleground for two top American retailers — physical Walmart versus digital Amazon.

Retailing behemoth Walmart with annual revenues northwards of $500 billion in conjunction with Google’s parent company Alphabet will acquire 70 to 75 per cent stake in domestic e-commerce giant Flipkart. Bentonville, Arkansas, meets Bangalore headlong through this mega transaction, even as Jeff Bezos’s Amazon is defeated at the gates.

The deal may be announced as early as Wednesday itself. The valuation for 70-75 per cent is expected to be in the vicinity of $15.2 billion, even as Flipkart will be valued at $20 billion. The investment will help accelerate Flipkart’s innovation on behalf of customers and will underscore Walmart’s commitment to sustained job creation and investment in India. The Walmart-Google combine will then enter into a straight bare knuckle fight with Amazon in India.

Walmart is expected to invest $2 billion directly by infusing fresh equity in India’s biggest e-comm success story. The 11-year brand founded by Sachin and Binny Bansal (unrelated) thus falls into American hands. Google is expected to subsequently pick up approximately 7 per cent stake in the entity at a valuation of $1.5 billion. The partnership will dominate the online space using Google Express’s Home device to order online in the future. Flipkart under the new order is likely to be listed as a Walmart subsidiary in India in 2019-20, similar to its model in Mexico. The fresh investment will bolster infrastructure building specifically in rural Bharat, boost the agri supply chain, provide customers with affordable goods and most importantly create new skilled jobs and fresh opportunities for farmers, small suppliers and women entrepreneurs.

To bankroll the investment, Walmart will use a combination of newly issued debt and cash on hand. Sachin Bansal, who reportedly opposed the deal with Walmart, will exit cashing in his 5.2 per cent stake. Flipkart’s existing shareholders, China’s Tencent Holdings and US-based Tiger Global Management, will exit partially and retain small stakes, but remain on the board. South Africa-based Naspers Ltd and Microsoft Corp will also keep small holdings in the new company. Sources close to developments indicated that these investors will likely have the option of selling their stake to the Bentonville-based retailer at a later date at the same valuation at which Walmart buys its majority stake in Flipkart.

SoftBank, which owns 20.8 per cent stake in the company will exit completely. The Masayoshi Son-controlled Japanese company will make a killing by selling its stake in Flipkart, with its investment of $2.5 billion set to fetch about $4 billion, a gain of 60 per cent. It was not immediately known how much of stake group CEO and co-founder Binny Bansal—w ill retain. He currently hold 5.1 per cent stake in Flipkart. Walmart India and Flipkart will continue to maintain distinct brands after the deal, but over time, its financials will be relayed through Walmart International. For the fiscal year ended March 31, Flipkart recorded a gross merchandise value (GMV) of $ 7.5 billion, effectively meaning that goods worth $ 7.5 billion were traded through its site involving thousands of sellers and millions of buyers. It recorded net sales of $ 4.6 billion during the year, representing more than 50 per cent growth in both cases.

New investors can pick up stake in Flipkart in a fresh round, which could bring down Walmart’s holding proportionately but slightly, even though it will continue to retain a significant majority holding. Walmart will in all probability use a mix of fresh debt and cash to finance the deal.
With the snapping up of Flipkart and its brands Jabong, Myntra and PhonePe and logistics firm Ekart, an Indian ecomm start up which has become a household name and brand to reckon with not just in India but worldwide for its innovation and sourcing model goes under. This way, another Indian brand will be acquired by a global heavy hitter. The trader community, a core BJP constituent, is already in disarray because of GST and DeMo will not take kindly to this deal. The Confederation of All India Traders (CAIT), an umbrella association representing millions of traders, has already demanded government probe of the Walmart-Flipkart deal, which it says will only encourage predatory pricing. It wanted the “unholy nexus” to be “scanned and stopped” and wondered why the government was “keeping its eyes and ears shut” despite knowing the “intent and hidden agenda of companies like Walmart”.

This will be the second time when Walmart and Google will offer a joint front to tackle the domination of Jeff Bezos-controlled Amazon in an online market place. Last year, both the companies had struck a partnership through Walmart products are sold on Google Express, the internet search giant’s online mall. This will be Walmart’s largest acquisition in the e-commerce space. It had acquired Jet.com for $3.3 billion in 2016. Last month, Walmart gave up control of its UK grocery chain Asda, merging it with British retailer J Sainsbury Plc. Walmart will retain a 42 per cent stake in the combined company. The decision to cede control of Asda is seen as part of Walmart’s global strategy to focus more attention and resources on faster-expanding markets such as India where consumer spending capacity has been rising significantly.

According to India Brand Equity Foundation, a government-supported research agency, the Indian e-commerce market is expected to reach $64 billion by 2020 and $200 billion by 2026 from $38.5 billion as of 2017. With growing internet penetration, internet users in India are expected to increase from 481 million as of December 2017 to 829 million by 2021. This will be Walmart’s second coming of sorts for India’s retail market. In 2013, it pulled out of its wholesale joint venture with Bharti Group. Walmart India currently operates 21 B2B Best Price cash-and-carry stores and one fulfilment centre in 19 cities across nine states in India.

question: What does the text say about how Jeff Bezos feels about Walmart's acquisition of Flipkart?

answer: No answer

critique: The text doesn't say anything about Jeff Bezos' feelings.

question: What does the text say about Flipkart?

answer: Flipkart is an e-commerce market based in India with 11 years of age. It has three separate business segments: its retail segment, its financial services segment, and its logistics segment. Pursuant to Walmart and Google investing a combined $3 billion in the entity, Flipkart's founders, Sachin and Binny Bansal will exit completely cashing in their equity stake. Flipkart's largest and immediate previous investor, SoftBank, which owns 20.8% of the company, will also exit completely by selling its stake in Flipkart.

critique: The answer omits the exact percentage of Walmart's stake in Flipkart.

critique: SoftBank having one stake of Flipkart is not mentioned.

critique: The answer is wrong. Flipkart is not an e-commerce market.

critique: The answer should mention the valuation of Flipkart.

critique: The answer inaccurately mentions that Flipkart has three separate business segments, however the text only mentions two.

question: What does the text say about Flipkart's other shareholders?

answer: Flipkart's other shareholders are Tencent Holdings, Tiger Global Management, Naspers Ltd, and Microsoft Corp. These shareholders will likely have the option of selling their stake to Walmart at a later date. Flipkart's co-founder, Sachin Bansal, will exit the company.

critique: The answer should mention that the other shareholders will exit partially.

critique: The answer should mention the percentage of stake each shareholder owns.

critique: The answer should mention that the other shareholders will retain small stakes.

critique: This response only answers half of what was asked of the shareholders.

critique: The text also mentions that Flipkart's other shareholders will exit partially and retain small stakes.

critique: The answer omits the stake of Flipkart's co-founder, Binny Bansal.

critique: The answer should mention that Sachin Bansal will cash in his stake.

question: What does the text say about Walmart?

answer: Walmart is a US-based retailing behemoth. It is a publicly traded company with annual revenues northwards of $500 billion. Walmart has been acquiring various e-commerce companies in order to penetrate into the Indian market.

critique: The answer should mention that Walmart is the largest retailer in the world.

critique: The answer should mention Walmart's plan to invest in Flipkart.

critique: The answer should mention Walmart's previous acquisitions.

critique: The answer should mention Walmart's acquisition of Flipkart.

critique: Walmart has been venturing into the Indian market using major acquisitions. Vacating from their UK venture should not be considered as an entry into the market but is a change in tactics. Omit this detail for the sake of accuracy.