text:
Cymbals crash in lightning strikes down long corridors, as I awaken. Blood is trickling down my nose. I can taste pennies and batteries. I sit up and reach around to the back of my head and feel the scar where they put the implant to prolong the ticking time bomb that is my brain.

"It's the dreams," they said. "They're dangerous."

Seven years.

I wake up and I'm somewhere else. I'm sitting at a desk in a room of t.v.'s. Languages are being spoken that I don't understand by people and things I don't recognize. Zeros and ones are being displayed to me on a computer screen. I push a button, and the languages are represented in a form I understand. Everyone goes silent as I hear a voice from behind me.

"All that you have to do, you have to do today. Until the day you realize this, you won't be free."

I'll never be free.

The scar on the back of my head oozes, and it runs down my finger. Mortified, I run to the bathroom to scrub it off. Having your brains in your hands is most certainly not the fondest of things to wake to. I look in the mirror and see that one of my eyes is blood red, while the other is a normal white and green. Heterochromia? No.

"Will this hurt?" I ask the doctor.

"Only if you think about it," he responds as he applies pressure to the scalpel pressed against my cervical vertibrae one. It hurts for the last time.

In the broken mirror of my bathroom I see a tear run down my scarred face parallel to the blood that has dried under my septum. I wash it away and look at my reflection again and smile as if they were never there.

There was a time when all I knew was love. A time when I felt. I mean, I can touch. I can understand touch, but the days when I felt are gone. A symptom of the lottery I won, and the triggers that opened it's box. Tears and smiles are only functional.

"If this moment should last longer than this moment, then it should only be in our minds." She said to me unfortunately facetious, but now I realize how relavent it was.

I dreamed a woman would kill me, I just didn't know it would come true so many times.

The sink fills with water washing my blood and brain down the drain. I blink and my blood eye stays open. A message has come in.

"A Lesson in Human Anatomy"
It takes fourteen pounds of pressure to break the mid section of the average human being's clavicle as long as the impulse is applied as a direct force on or near the curves of the bone. End.

I am human. I fight gravity. I fight death. There is nothing to save me. I float and wander and survive until I don't. I despise these messages. I used to be an artist. Curves had some meaning to me at one time, a violent meaning still, but different than this.

"Your emotions have gotten the best of you. How can you live to benefit The Order with so many emotions that lead to dangerous dreams? It's best we get rid of them."

"For the order," I mumble aloud, and as if they could hear me, a new message comes in.

"New target"
The Order is getting closer to the top of this terrorist cell wreaking havoc on the good people of our society. The righteous and kind citizens of this national democratic empire are depending on you to keep them safe. Their life is in your hands. Your mission is Marie Sklodowska. End.

The message closes, and a life closely observed comes pouring into my conscious. I've lived many, just to see them disappear. This one is different.

It's almost always a woman. She's almost always beautiful and making waves, a trait I used to admire. This one though, she is a tsunami, and I have to meet her in the middle of the ocean to break her before she reaches shore.

A consequence. A life prolonged from one day to one day for seven years.

title: Enter the Antihero

question: Summarize everything relating to the narrator's physical appearance.

answer: The narrator has a scar on the back of their head. One of their eyes is blood red, while the other is a normal white and green. They have a scarred face. The narrator's blood eye stays open.

critique: The answer omits that the narrator has a scar on their finger.

question: What does the story say about the narrator's emotional state?

answer: The narrator is a soldier for the Order, a national democratic empire that is presumably the United States. He is implanted with a brain bomb that is dangerous and has to be removed surgically. The narrator has been implanted for seven years, and he has not felt any emotions for that long. He is told that his emotions have gotten the best of him, and he is to be removed from the Order.

critique: The response is missing a few details about the narrator's emotional state.

critique: The narrator is not a soldier for the Order. He is a soldier for The Order.

critique: The narrator's emotional state is not discussed in the story.

critique: The narrator's not always removed from the Order directly. Their "emotions are removed" via cranial neural remapping.

text: The answer includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

category: coherence

question: What does the story say about the theme of free will?

answer: No answer

critique: No answer is directly provided in the text, but there are some implied comments about it throughout the story.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator doesn't have free will.

critique: The answer should mention that the story implies that the narrator has no free will.


split: train

text:
When you’re working at a startup, even if you’ve never touched Python or Photoshop, you still need to be able to get stuff done when technical or design tasks come your way.

No, no one’s going to ask you to code up an app from scratch or design a new company website. But you still may get asked to deliver on projects or tasks that have some element of coding or design.

For example, here are some very reasonable requests you might receive (and things that I would ask of anyone on my team at HireNurture—even folks who don’t have a tech or design background):

-   “I don’t like the look of that button in the middle section of our homepage. Can you change it?”
-   “We need to build a new customer-facing sales deck. Can you make one this week?”
-   “We need a landing page for this new promotion we’re starting next week. Can you set this up and make sure that any new email addresses registered from the page get pushed to our email marketing system?”

If you were asked to do one of these things, what would you do?

Would you run to one of the engineers or designers and outsource the task to them? Give it a go yourself, then ask them to help you with the parts you don’t know how to handle?

Probably. Problem is, what you’re asking of your dev or design team is 101-level, basic work. It’s a terrible use of their time when they should be spending time on the harder and more valuable task of building a product.

The good news is, I have some better answers for you. Answers that you can immediately take and apply to your work at a startup. And most importantly, answers that will show you’re the JFDI type of person who a startup can build around as it grows.

Let’s go back to the earlier examples so I can show you exactly what you need to do:

1. “I don’t like the look of that button in the middle section of our homepage. Can you change it?”

I know you’re tempted to use good ’ol Microsoft Paint. But you’re better than that.

Your next best option: one of the 8,353 button sites on the web (including my favorite, if only for the name: Da Button Factory). Or maybe you “borrow” a button from another site.

But you know how it goes when you go that route. You spend an hour trying to tweak it to look just right on your site, and you never quite get there.

So let me share a little secret with you: Just use Fiverr.

Fiverr is a marketplace where you can access low-cost creative, administrative, and technical services—in essence, short freelance jobs—all of which have a starting price of $5! And yes, there are plenty of folks on Fiverr who would be more than happy to create a beautiful button for you. Give one (or two, or three) people a try. After all, we’re only talking about $5 here.

Aside from getting your shiny new button, you’ve also eased into the world of outsourcing! Learning how to use outsourced labor is critical for anyone in the startup game. Be glad that you’re learning it now, and don’t be afraid to take what you learned to show off in your next startup interview, either!

2. “We need to build a customer-facing sales deck. Can you make one this week?”

If your first instinct is to gin up a sales pitch and put it in a default PowerPoint template with your company logo pasted in, let me stop you before you totally tank your startup career!

A better method? Take a Lean Startup approach to creating the deck. Here’s how that would work:

-   Sketch out some talking points and messages that you think will resonate with your customers. Put those points into a one-page document. Don’t worry if it’s not perfect at the get-go.
-   Share that document with a few existing customers and a few of your salespeople to get their feedback.
-   Incorporate their feedback into a final set of talking points and messages.
-   Hire someone on Fiverr or a design-focused freelancer marketplace like Dribbble to create a final deck that looks visually appealing.
-   Give that finalized deck to the people within your startup who need it.

Do you see what we did? We didn’t spend any money or roll something out until we knew it would be useful. And that’s a taste of the Lean Startup approach applied to sales and marketing. #winning

3. “We need a landing page for this new promotion we’re starting next week. Can you set this up and make sure that any new email addresses registered from the page get pushed to our email marketing system?”

No, you’re still not allowed to talk to your dev team about this one! Here’s how to handle it:

-   Sign up for a landing page service like Leadpages. It makes design and building of landing pages dead simple, and they look good, too. Other services you might consider are Strikingly or Unbounce. Here’s an example of how I’m using a landing page (on Leadpages) to share a free chapter from my upcoming e-book, _Finding Startup Jobs_.
-   Sign up for an email marketing service if your company doesn’t already have one in place. I use MadMimi, but other popular systems like Mailchimp or aWeber work just as well.The most important thing is to select an email marketing service that is supported by your landing page provider. That way, you don’t have to deal with any custom coding to make the leads from the landing page funnel into your email marketing system.
-   Create the landing page. Write the copy and add images. For the images, yes, you could grab some awesome clip art from the web and call it a day. But now that you know about Fiverr, why not get something custom created? For example, here’s one of our landing pages built on Leadpages that includes a custom image we had built by someone on Fiverr.
-   Bonus Points: Many landing page providers will let you attach some special code (often called a conversion pixel or tracking code) so you know how many people registered on your landing page and where they came from. Ask your marketing team for these tracking codes before they think to give them to you, and they’ll be impressed with your initiative.
-   2X Bonus Points: Wouldn’t it be cool if you could test different landing pages at the same time to see which messages or offers worked best? This is a lot of work to implement by hand, but thankfully there are great and easy-to-use solutions like Optimize.ly that let anyone run this kind of test.
-   3X Bonus Points: You can set up automated drip marketing to the folks who register on your landing page. This will keep those leads you captured with your landing page warm. For example, here’s an example of an drip email that we send to tech recruiters who download our free recruiting e-books a few days after they’ve received the e-book.

You made it!

By following these directions, you got a bunch of stuff launched at your startup without bugging anyone on your dev or design teams. Congrats on making their lives easier!

What’s more, though, being able to take care of these dev or design tasks as a non-technical startup employee shows your team that you’re more than just a “non-technical person”—you’re someone who finds a way to get stuff done.

Now pat yourself on the back—and get back to work!

question: What does the story say about Fiverr?

answer: The story says that Fiverr is a marketplace where you can access low-cost creative, administrative, and technical services. It's a great place to get a button or a landing page created. The author warns against using Fiverr for other services because it's not the best place to go for those services.

critique: The passage doesn't say anything about the quality of service on Fiverr.

critique: The author doesn't warn against using Fiverr for other services.

question: What does the story say about Upwork?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the article does not mention Upwork.

critique: It is omitted that the author says that Upwork is a marketplace where you can access low-cost creative, administrative, and technical services.


text:
COMPUTATIONAL PARTICLE PHYSICS refers to the methods and computing tools developed in and used by particle physics research. Like computational chemistry or computational biology, it is, for particle physics both a specific branch and an interdisciplinary field relying on computer science, theoretical and experimental particle physics and mathematics. The main fields of computational particle physics are: lattice field theory (numerical computations), automatic calculation of particle interaction or decay (computer algebra) and event generators (stochastic methods).[1][2][3]

Computing tools

-   Computer algebra: Many of the computer algebra languages were developed initially to help particle physics calculations: Reduce, Mathematica, Schoonschip, Form, GiNaC.[4]
-   Data Grid: The largest planned use of the grid systems will be for the analysis of the LHC - produced data. Large software packages have been developed to support this application like the LHC Computing Grid (LCG) . A similar effort in the wider e-Science community is the GridPP collaboration, a consortium of particle physicists from UK institutions and CERN.[5]
-   Data Analysis Tools: These tools are motivated by the fact that particle physics experiments and simulations often create large datasets, e.g. see references.[6][7]

_David Rousseau, “The Software behind the Higgs Boson Discovery,” IEEE Software, pp. 11-15, Sept.-Oct., 2012_

-   Software Libraries: Many software libraries are used for particle physics computations. Also important are packages that simulate particle physics interactions using Monte Carlo simulation techniques (i.e. event generators).

History

Particle physics played a role in the early history of the internet, the World-Wide Web was created by Tim Berners-Lee when working at CERN in 1991.

Computer Algebra

Note: This section contains an excerpt from 'Computer Algebra in Particle Physics' by Stefan Weinzierl

Particle physics is an important field of application for computer algebra and exploits the capabilities of Computer Algebra Systems (CAS). This leads to valuable feed-back for the development of CAS. Looking at the history of computer algebra systems, the first programs date back to the 1960s.[8] The first systems were almost entirely based on LISP (“LISt Programming language”). LISP is an interpreted language and, as the name already indicates, designed for the manipulation of lists. Its importance for symbolic computer programs in the early days has been compared to the importance of FORTRAN for numerical programs in the same period.[9] Already in this first period, the program REDUCE had some special features for the application to high energy physics. An exception to the LISP-based programs was SCHOONSHIP, written in assembler language by Martinus J. G. Veltman and specially designed for applications in particle physics. The use of assembler code lead to an incredible fast program (compared to the interpreted programs at that time) and allowed the calculation of more complex scattering processes in high energy physics. It has been claimed the program's importance was recognized in 1998 by awarding the half of the Nobel prize to Veltman.[10] Also the program MACSYMA deserves to be mentioned explicitly, since it triggered important development with regard to algorithms. In the 1980s new computer algebra systems started to be written in C. This enabled the better exploitation of the resources of the computer (compared to the interpreted language LISP) and at the same time allowed to maintain portability (which would not have been possible in assembler language). This period marked also the appearance of the first commercial computer algebra system, among which Mathematica and Maple are the best known examples. In addition, also a few dedicated programs appeared, an example relevant to particle physics is the program FORM by J. Vermaseren as a (portable) successor to SCHOONSHIP. More recently issues of the maintainability of large projects became more and more important and the overall programming paradigma changed from procedural programming to object-oriented design. In terms of programming languages this was reflected by a move from C to C++. Following this change of paradigma, the library GiNaC was developed. The GiNac library allows symbolic calculations in C++.

Code generation for computer algebra can also be used in this area.

Lattice field theory

Lattice field theory was created by Kenneth Wilson in 1974.[11] Simulation techniques were later developed from statistical mechanics.[12][13]

Since the early 1980s, LQCD researchers have pioneered the use of massively parallel computers in large scientific applications, using virtually all available computing systems including traditional main-frames, large PC clusters, and high-performance systems. In addition, it has also been used as a benchmark for high-performance computing, starting with the IBM Blue Gene supercomputer.

Eventually national and regional QCD grids were created: LATFOR (continental Europe), UKQCD and USQCD. The ILDG (International Lattice Data Grid) is an international venture comprising grids from the UK, the US, Australia, Japan and Germany, and was formed in 2002.[14]

[1] https://arxiv.org/abs/1301.1211 _Computational Particle Physics for Event Generators and Data Analysis_ retrieved 8/24/20

[2] https://www.researchgate.net/publication/234060239_Computational_Particle_Physics_for_Event_Generators_and_Data_Analysis _Computational Particle Physics for Event Generators and Data Analysis_ retrieved 8/24/20

[3] https://www2.ccs.tsukuba.ac.jp/projects/ILFTNet/ _International research network for computational particle physics_ retrieved 8/24/20

[4] _Stefan Weinzierl:- “Computer Algebra in Particle Physics.” pgs 5-7. Accessed 1 January 2012; (alternative link) : “Computer Algebra in Particle Physics.” . Accessed 1 January 2012. “Seminario Nazionale di Fisica Teorica”, Parma, September 2002._

[5] ''GridPP website '' : accessed 19 June 2012.

[6] '' Dirk Duellmann, '' “Oracle Streams for the Large Hadron Collider” _, page 3. Accessed 1 January 2011._

[7] '' M Liu, W Kuehn et al. , '' “Hardware/Software Co-design of a General-Purpose Computation Platform in Particle Physics” _, page 1. Accessed 20 February 2012._

[8] _Stefan Weinzierl, op. cit. : pgs 3-5._

[9] _Stefan Weinzierl, op. cit. : pgs 3-5._

[10] _Stefan Weinzierl, op. cit. : pgs 3-5._

[11] '' Kenneth G. Wilson, Confinement of quarks, Physical Review D, 10, 1974, p. 2445–59 ''

[12] '' David J. E. Callaway and Aneesur Rahman (1982). “Microcanonical Ensemble Formulation of Lattice Gauge Theory”. Physical Review Letters 49 (9): 613–616. Bibcode 1982PhRvL..49..613C. .''

[13] '' David J. E. Callaway and Aneesur Rahman (1983). “Lattice gauge theory in the microcanonical ensemble”. Physical Review D28 (6): 1506–1514. Bibcode 1983PhRvD..28.1506C. . ''

[14] '' C.M. Maynard: International Lattice Data Grid: Turn on, plug in, and download. Ch.2, pg. 3. arXiv:1001.5207, 2010. ''

title: Computational particle physics

question: What does the text say about pioneers in computational particle physics?

answer: Tim Berners-Lee is credited for creating the World Wide Web when working at CERN in 1991. Martinus J. G. Veltman was a pioneer in the use of assembler language for high energy physics calculations. Veltman was also awarded half of the Nobel Prize in 1998. J. Vermaseren was a pioneer in the field of object-oriented programming.

critique: The answer should mention Kenneth Wilson.

critique: The answer should include Kenneth Wilson as a pioneer.

critique: The answer omits the pioneers in lattice field theory.

critique: The answer omits the pioneers of lattice field theory.

critique: The answer omits several pioneers. It should be rewritten.

critique: The response inaccurately mentions that J. Vermaseren was a pioneer in the field of object-oriented programming. However, it was Stefan Weinzierl who was a pioneer in this field.

critique: "Martinus J. G. Veltman was a pioneer in the use of assembler language for high energy physics calculations." is off-topic as it doesn't have anything to do with pioneers in computational physics.

critique: The answer omits the pioneers in the field of lattice field theory.

question: What does the text say about data grids?

answer: Data grids are used for the analysis of LHC-produced data. Large software packages have been developed to support this application. A similar effort in the wider e-Science community is the GridPP collaboration, a consortium of particle physicists from UK institutions and CERN.

critique: The answer omits the LHC Computing Grid.

critique: The answer should mention the LHC Computing Grid.

critique: The answer omits the use of data grids in particle physics.

critique: It's omitted that GridPP collaboration is a data grid.

question: Summarize everything that happened in the 1990s.

answer: In the 1990s, the LHC was built as was CERN. The LHC Computing Grid was created. Particle physics played a role in the early history of the internet. Computational particle physics began in the 1980's.

critique: The LHC Computing Grid was not created in the 1990s.

critique: The LHC Computing Grid was created in the 2000s.

critique: In addition to the LHC Computing Grid, the other notable event was the awarding of the half of the Nobel prize to Veltman for his SCHOONSHIP program.

critique: The answer is missing a few details about the 1990s.

text: The answer should mention that Tim Berners-Lee created the World-Wide Web in the 1990s.

category: coverage

question: What does the text say about smartphones?

answer: No answer


text:
We were enjoying the cool night air. I lit a cigarette and took a quick harsh drag. My friend sat next me, quiet. He wouldn’t admit his thoughts, but I could see them on his face. I sat with the cigarette between fingers, slowly burning down, quickly giving me a buzz, relieving my stress. He was waiting for a text. I was waiting for anything. That night I wore shorts and a sweater: comfortably chilled. I can’t remember, but it is possible that we had been drinking.

From the vantage point of my friend’s porch we could see them approach her building and stand just outside her door. She was anxious. He, as always, was calm and cool.

I turned to my friend, “Do you see this?” I took a drag, eager for what happened next.

They stood there. Talking. His jeans loose, hems on the concrete, striped hoody, and backwards flat-billed baseball cap, all synonymous with his profile. She wore a skirt, netted leggings underneath, large boots coming half way up her calf, a low cut shirt and a half buttoned up purple cardigan sweater, her sunset red hair kept neat under a black beret. These two friends stood talking in the dark of night; thinking that they were alone in this moment. That for a few minutes the world was theirs. I watched on, ignorant to my friend’s presence and text chimes. In my mind I saw and heard their conversation. She was thanking him for being a good guy to walk her home. He said it was nothing and that he was happy to do it; “No problem.” One of them checked their phone, probably he did. He motioned to go. She asked him to wait. She stepped in for a hug and embraced him. He wasn’t reluctant, he didn’t stop to think about the implications, and he did not consider his girlfriend hundreds of miles away. He didn’t think about how much his girlfriend meant to him, and he didn’t consider how much this girl holding him right now wanted to be more than friends. He held her tight in his arms. And he released first. She held a second longer, understanding that now, given the circumstances, and his obligations, that he could not be with her. She turned to unlock her door; she pulled it open and stood there, holding it. One hand on the door, the other hanging at her side. They said goodbye, he turned and walked away. But she didn’t turn in. She stood there.

I was fixated on her. I wanted to walk over to her and tell her I’m sorry it wouldn’t work out with him. I wanted to run after him and tell him what he’s doing to her. But I couldn’t. I watched her. This image is cast in my mind like stone. The yellow lights on the wall above her emitting their soft enveloping glow. The way she held most of her weight on one foot. Her head cocked slightly to one side and inclined towards his fleeting presence. And my friend reclined on next to me. Cigarette smoke drifting before my face in the breeze.

To me this moment only lasted about fifteen seconds. She watched after him. I saw in her body language how she registered the ramifications of their conversation and interactions. Her body slouched. Her hand fell off the door letting it swing in, stopping against her shoulder. She loosened her firm stance and stepped one foot back to turn, but she couldn’t yet. She had to watch him a few seconds longer; she had to hope that he’d changed; that maybe he did feel the same way for her. Hoped that maybe he’d turn back for her. I could only imagine how long this felt for her, the emotions she felt as he went farther away, without looking back: the impact of his words tonight, the realizations within that hug, the disappointment and despondency of that brief moment. She finally turned in—sad, lonely, defeated. I felt sorry for her. I felt guilty that I had intruded on this moment; that I watched something that was supposed to be private and within only her world.

I finished my cigarette, crushed the butt, and threw it away.

title: A Goodbye (ws please)

question: What is the theme of the story?

answer: The theme of the story is about a guy who is in a relationship, but still has feelings for another girl.

critique: The theme is not about the guy, but about the narrator and his friend who intrudes on a private moment.

critique: In reality, it would be more accurate to say that the theme is that of heartbreak and unrequited love.

critique: "The theme of the story is about a guy who is in a relationship, but still has feelings for another girl." - while this is true, the theme of the story is actually about the narrator's guilt.

critique: The theme is not about a guy who is in a relationship, but still has feelings for another girl.

critique: It is omitted that the guy has a girlfriend hundreds of miles away.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The theme of the story is about a guy who is in a relationship, but still has feelings for another girl.

critique: It is omitted that the guy is not in a relationship with the girl he has feelings for.

question: Summarize the narrator's perspective on this rejection scenario.

answer: The narrator is fixated on the girl's body language as she registers the ramifications of their conversation and interactions. The narrator feels sorry for her and feels guilty that they had intruded on this moment.

critique: The narrator is not fixated on the girl's body language.

critique: While the narrator is expressiong sympathies and emotions, they are not the only person that can feel pity and guilt.

critique: The narrator is not the only person who is fixated on the girl's body language. The narrator's friend also sees the same thing.

critique: The narrator is fixated on the girl's body language as she registers the ramifications of their conversation and interactions.

question: Summarize the plot twist in the story.

answer: The narrator and his friend are sitting on a porch, watching the couple. The narrator is fixated on the woman, and he wants to run to her and tell her that it won't work out with the guy. He wants to tell her that the guy is not treating her right. However, he can't because he feels he is intruding on the couple's privacy. The narrator finishes his cigarette and throws it away, and the woman finally turns in, sad and lonely.

critique: The narrator doesn't want to run to the woman. He wants to run after the guy and tell him what he is doing to the woman.

critique: The narrator is not fixated on the woman. He is fixated on the couple.

critique: The narrator is not fixated on the woman, he is fixated on the guy.

critique: The narrator didn't throw away his cigarette because of the plot twist.

text: There is no plot twist in the story; the answer simply summarizes the conclusion.

question: Explain how the narrator is able to realistically assume what happened during this interaction.

answer: The narrator is a third party observer of the interaction between the man and the woman, and their emotions are laid out for the reader to see.

critique: It's omitted that the narrator is able to see the body language of the woman and that the narrator has a good imagination.

critique: The narrator and their friend are the third party observers.

critique: The narrator is not a third party observer.

critique: The question isn't asking about the narrator's relationship with the characters. It's asking about how the narrator can know what happened between the man and woman.


text:
MOYCASHEL (),[1] previously the barony of Rossaughe, before that, Delamares country,[2] is a barony in south County Westmeath, in the Republic of Ireland. It was formed by 1542.[3] It is bordered by three other baronies: Clonlonan to the west, Rathconrath to the north, Moyashel and Magheradernon to the north-east and Fartullagh to the west. The largest population centre is Kilbeggan.

Geography

Moycashel has an area of .[4] The barony contains a part of the south–west end of Lough Ennell and the River Brosna flows through Kilbeggan before it connects to the River Shannon.

The M6 motorway passes through the barony to the south of Kilbeggan and (together with the M4) links Dublin with Galway.

The N52, a national secondary road passes through Kilbeggan linking the M7 motorway from just south of Nenagh, County Tipperary to the M1 motorway north of Dundalk in County Louth.

The R446 regional road (the old N6) runs through Kilbeggan and roughly parallel to the M6, also connecting Dublin with Galway.

In addition the R389 (linking Kilbeggan to the R392 near Moyvore) and the R391 (linking Clara, County Offaly to Mullingar, County Westmeath) pass through the barony.

Civil parishes of the barony

This table[5] lists an historical geographical sub-division of the barony known as the civil parish (not to be confused with an Ecclesiastical parish).

  Name in English           Name in Irish
  ------------------------- ------------------------------
  Ardnurcher or Horseleap   _Baile Átha an Urchair_
  Castletownkindalen        _Baile an Chaisleáin_
  Durrow                    _Darú_
  Dysart                    _An Díseart_
  Kilbeggan                 _Cill Bheagáin_
  Kilcumreragh              _Cill Chruimthir Fhiachrach_
  Newtown                   _An Baile Nua_
  Rahugh                    _Ráth Aodha_

Towns, villages and townlands

-   Ballynagore
-   Castletown Geoghegan
-   Dysart
-   Kilbeggan
-   Rosemount
-   Streamstown

There are 171 townlands in the barony of Moycashel.[6]

Buildings and other places of note

-   Kilbeggan Distillery
-   Kilbeggan Racecourse
-   The old Market House, Kilbeggan
-   Middleton Park House

[1] Barony of Moycashel _The Placenames Database of Ireland_ Retrieved 31 May 2015

[2] Irish Act 34 Henry VIII c.1; see

[3] Moycashel _townlands.ie_ Retrieved 31 May 2015

[4]

[5] Civil parishes of the barony of Moycashel. _The Placenames Database of Ireland_ Retrieved 8 Jun 2015

[6]

title: Moycashel

question: What does the text say about Moycashel's history?

answer: It is bordered by three other baronies: Clonlonan to the west, Rathconrath to the north, Moyashel and Magheradernon to the north-east and Fartullagh to the west. Its oldest known name is Crosthwaithe, which dates back to 1542 when Henry VIII dissolved the monasteries and it was portioned to Sir Thomas Cusacke. In 1580, it was renamed Delamares country, which lasted until the 20th century when it officially became Moycashel.

critique: The first sentence is not relevant to Moycashel's history.

critique: The text does not say anything about Moycashel's history.

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LYUDMYLA LEONTIIVNA DENISOVA[1] (; ) (born July 6, 1960 in Arkhangelsk, Russian SFSR) is a Ukrainian politician and former Minister of Labor and Social Policy who on 15 March 2018 was elected Commissioner for Human Rights in Ukraine.[2][3]

Biography

Raised by her mother Nina Ivanovna Ankudinova (born 1934) in Arkhangelsk Denisova graduated from the Arkhangelsk Pedagogical School (1978), the Leningrad State University (1989) and the Tavria Institute of Enterprise and Law (1995).[4]

Professional career

Denisova was a teacher at a preschool in the Russian city of Arkhangelsk (school №78, 1979–80).[5] For the next nine years Denisova held different posts in the Arkhangelsk provincial law court.[6] In 1989, she moved to Ukraine and became the legal adviser of the Crimean Provincial Committee of Ukraine (1990–91).[7] From 1991 she worked in the Republic of Crimea's Administration of the pension fund until 1998.[8]

Political career

In 1998 Denisova became the Minister of Economy and Finances in the Crimean government.[9] In Ukraine's Autonomous Republic of Crimea, she served as Minister of Economy, Minister of Finance and head of the Treasury Department. Denisova was named Politician of the Year in 2001. In 2000 Denisova was detained for 24 hours and charged with power abuse.[10] Denisova has stated she was persecuted for refusing to sign a budget document.[11] This criminal case was soon closed.[12]

Denisova is a member of Batkivshchina (Yulia Tymoshenko Bloc) since 2005.[13] During the 2006 and 2007 parliamentary elections, she was elected as a deputy to the Verkhovna Rada (Ukrainian parliament).

Minister

On December 18, 2007, Yulia Tymoshenko, with a margin of two votes, was elected Prime Minister.[14] and the second Tymoshenko Government was formed between the Yulia Tymoshenko Bloc and Our Ukraine–People's Self-Defense Bloc in which Denisova was elected Minister of Labour and Social Policy.

In October 2009 Denisova was ranked 15th in a top 100 of “most influential women in Ukraine” compiled by experts for the Ukrainian magazine Focus (six places lower than non-minister and fellow Batkivshchina member Natalia Korolevska).[15]

2010 Crimean parliamentary election

Denisova headed the electoral list of Batkivshchina during the 2010 Crimean parliamentary election.[16] Batkivshchina did not win seats in the Supreme Council of Crimea.[17]

2012 Ukrainian parliamentary election

Denisova was placed at number 38 on the electoral list of Batkivshchina during the 2012 Ukrainian parliamentary election.[18] She was re-elected into parliament.[19]

2nd minister post

On 27 February 2014 Denisova became Minister of Labor and Social Policy in the Yatsenyuk Government.[20]

In September 2014 Denisova became a founding member of her new party People's Front.[21]

2014 Ukrainian parliamentary election

In the 2014 Ukrainian parliamentary election Denisova was re-elected into parliament placed 15th on the electoral list of People's Front.[22][23][24]

On 15 March 2018 the Ukrainian parliament elected Denisova Commissioner for Human Rights in Ukraine.[25]

[1]  Short bio, LIGA

[2] https://www.pravda.com.ua/news/2018/03/15/7174734/

[3] Maidan nominates Yatseniuk for prime minister, Interfax-Ukraine (26 February 2014)
Ukrainian parliament endorses new cabinet, Interfax-Ukraine (27 February 2014)

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[9] Новый состав Кабмина принят единогласно , news.mediaport.ua

[10] Is She Next?, Kyiv Post (September 3, 2010)

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[15]  Рейтинг Фокуса: 100 самых влиятельных женщин и 100 деталей о них , Focus

[16] Liudmyla Denisova heads electoral list of Crimean branch of Batkivschyna Party, Kyiv Post (September 30, 2010)

[17]  Results of the elections, preliminary data, on interactive maps by Ukrayinska Pravda (November 8, 2010)

[18] They Call Themselves the Opposition, The Ukrainian Week (31 August 2012)

[19]  Список депутатів нової Верховної Ради, Ukrayinska Pravda (11 November 2012)

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[21] Yatseniuk elected head of political council of People's Front Party , Demotix (9 September 2014)

[22] Poroshenko Bloc to have greatest number of seats in parliament , Ukrinform (8 November 2014)
People's Front 0.33% ahead of Poroshenko Bloc with all ballots counted in Ukraine elections - CEC , Interfax-Ukraine (8 November 2014)
Poroshenko Bloc to get 132 seats in parliament - CEC, Interfax-Ukraine (8 November 2014)

[23]  Full electoral list of “Fatherland” , TVi (15 September 2014)

[24]  Electoral list of People's Front, Ukrayinska Pravda (20 September 2014)

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title: Lyudmyla Denisova

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answer: Denisova graduated from the Arkhangelsk Pedagogical School in 1978, the Leningrad State University in 1989, and the Tavria Institute of Enterprise and Law in 1995.

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question: What does the text say about Denisova's political career?

answer: Denisova was a teacher at a preschool in Arkhangelsk. She was a legal adviser of the Crimean Provincial Committee of Ukraine. She was the Minister of Economy and Finances in the Crimean government. Denisova was a member of Batkivshchina since 2005. She was elected as a deputy to the Verkhovna Rada during the 2006 and 2007 parliamentary elections. She was the Minister of Labor and Social Policy in the Yatsenyuk Government. Denisova was re-elected into parliament in the 2014 Ukrainian parliamentary election. She was elected Commissioner for Human Rights in Ukraine.

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[5 Ways to Help Your Dog Through Fireworks]

If you were to ask Willow what her favorite holiday was, I believe she would say Thanksgiving… Yes, definitely Thanksgiving.
As far as her least favorite holiday, well… it’s a tie between New Year’s Eve and 4th of July. Why?

THE ALL-MIGHTY FIREWORKS, THAT’S WHY.

IT IS HARD TO GRASP HOW SCARY THESE JOYFUL CELEBRATIONS CAN BE FOR A DOG (OR CAT). BUT IF WE CAN, FOR A MOMENT, FORGET THAT WE KNOW WHAT FIREWORKS ARE AND TRY TO EXPERIENCE THEM FROM A DIFFERENT POINT OF VIEW, PERHAPS WE COULD SEE THEM AS WHAT THEY ARE IN THEIR SIMPLEST FORM: _SUDDEN, RUMBLING, UNEXPECTED, LOUD EXPLOSIONS WITH BRIGHT FLASHES OF LIGHT._ MOST ANIMALS (AND QUITE A FEW HUMANS) DON’T FIND MUCH FUN IN THAT.

While some dogs and cats could care less about fireworks (bless them), many of them spend the night(s) in constant stress and panic. You know the statistics already, more pets go missing on July 4th than any other night of the year.

BELOW IS A LIST OF THE TOP FIVE WAYS I HAVE FOUND TO GIVE WILLOW AND HER FELINE SISTER LEELOO A MORE PEACEFUL NIGHT. I DEARLY HOPE SOMETHING IN THIS LIST WILL BE HELPFUL TO YOU AND YOURS.

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Willow’s Top 5 Serenity Tips

1. GET THEM DOG-TIRED
Exercise and mental stimulation in the form of any activity your dog (or cat) enjoys will be fundamental in helping them start the day off right so they don’t have an abundance of energy in the evening to focus on fear and stress. Make sure it is something they enjoy and does not send them over threshold. A long play session at the beach, a good hike with friends, scenting games, chasing after their favorite toy, learning a new trick or anything else you got, bring it.

2. TAKE THE EDGE OFF
There are many great holistic ways to help your beasts feel a little more relaxed. I have listed my favorites for you here:

-   _CANNA COMPANION-_ a unique blend of Cannabis sativa strains, frequently referred to as hemp, designed to enhance the supportive benefits of the Cannabis plant while minimizing the ‘high-inducing’ concentrations of THC. I give Willow one capsule with each meal (twice a day) and make sure to feed her dinner an hour before the fireworks start. For Leeloo, I open a small capsule formulated for cats and sprinkle some on her food twice a day.
-   _TREATIBLES-_ a different way to provide your pet with the calming benefits of hemp and CBD oil can come in the form of yummy chews, drops or gel capsules. I am especially keen on _TREATIBLES_ when I have run out of my _CANNA COMPANION_ and can quickly pick some up some chews at my local shop. My wallet is especially grateful for the chews, since the capsules and oils can get a little pricey.
-   _JACKSON GALAXY/SPIRIT ESSENCES SOLUTIONS-_ A flower essence solution you can add to your pet’s water or food or spray in the room or bedding. We use Stress Stopper for any stressful situation, from trips to the vet and especially on 4th of July. I add it to their water and make sure and spray some around the house. They have many other super helpful solutions for different behaviors and situations.
-   _THUNDERSHIRT-_ Willow’s Thundershirt has been a staple in helping her feel comfortable and safe during stressful situations, especially when she was a baby and well into her adolescence. We still pull it out for any situation we know will be stressful for her or if we know we will not be able to get away from the fireworks. I am in the process of familiarizing Leeloo to her own Thundershirt now. Cats are a little trickier, but they deserve just as much support and protection.
-   _ZUKE’S ENHANCE CALMING FUNCTIONAL CHEWS-_ I simply love this new line of functional supplement treats Zuke’s created. The Calming chews have passionflower, valerian and chamomile among other natural remedies wrapped up in a yummy chicken or peanut butter bite-sized treat that I can offer to Willow throughout the day to help ease any stress and nervousness.

3. GIVE THEM A SAFE SPACE
Prepare your home to be a safe haven for your dogs and cats. Close all the windows, close the blinds or draw the curtains. Get some soothing tunes going, I like to play either some gentle nature sounds with music, light classical or my favorite, _THROUGH A DOG’S EAR_ CDs. They now have a portable player called iCalm for dogs or cats! I also get some portable fans for the bedroom and main livingspace Willow and Leeloo will hang out in and set them on medium to high. Not only will the fans keep the air moving, they will also help drown out any outside noise from the festivities. I open the closets in case they want to go cuddle up somewhere dark, quiet and cozy. Just in case, make sure your pets are wearing their identification on a collar, updated microchip etc. On occasions when we can’t get away for the 4th, I have Willow wear her bright orange harness on top of her Thundershirt. The harness has another set of identification tags. You never know, life happens, and collars slip. You want to give your dog or cat as much of a chance to get back home safely should they find themselves lost.

4. FIND YOUR OWN ZEN
If you are opting out of the festivities and hunkering down for the night with your pets to keep them company (thank you, you are amazing), make sure you do whatever it is you need to take care of you first. Go to a yoga class, or go for a nice run. make a list of movies or shows to catch up on. Cook up a comforting meal or order take out. Light some candles, pop open some wine, meditate, dance in your underwear… do whatever you need to feel your best, because your beasts will need your calm and reassuring touch. Be patient, gentle and kind with them; remember that they don’t know what is going on or the why of things. This is the part where you have their back.

5. HIT THE ROAD JACK!
Though #5 is really our #1 way to avoid stressful nights of fireworks, I know it is not always possible. Whether you load up the pack into your car and taka a nice long drive or you plan ahead and trade celebrations and the _Star Spangled Banner_ for a tent under the stars, hitting the road to a place far away from danger zones is (in our opinion) the best way to help your animals cope. We like to get away, especially since fireworks are allowed in Petaluma, and kids start their partying two days before the actual 4th. For the past three years, we search for a quiet, peaceful campsite on _HIPCAMP_, order ourselves some _FIRESIDE PROVISIONS_ and pack a kit with everything I listed on #2 (just in case). This is my kind of celebration of independence anyway, who needs the fireworks and fairgrounds, give me the true meaning of 4th of July: a celebration of this beautiful place and the freedom to spend a night with our loved ones however we choose.

Whatever you choose to do, we wish you a safe and comfortable night filled with peace for your dogs and cats and a very happy holiday to you!

_HERE’S TO STARRY SKIES AND FIREFLIES,_
_Nat + Willow_

question: What are the methods used for "taking the edge off" of a dog's fear or fireworks?

answer: The methods used are: cannabis, flower essence, Thundershirt, and Zuke's calming chews.

critique: The answer should also include an item mentioned in the text: Treatibles.

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question: Why are New Year's Eve and 4th of July Willow's least favorite holidays?

answer: Because of the fireworks.

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The Beginning

The leaves fall relentlessly through sheets of rain. A boy rushes to get to the subway. Past the shallow puddles on the sidewalk, not giving a second glance at people on the street, he sprints down the stairs and into the underground network.

The boy is trying to make it halfway across the city, a one-train trip, only three stops, and the next one won’t come for another hour. A backpack slung over his back, it’s contents being a science textbook and a book entitled *Violin: From Crescendo To Concerto*, he is headed to a five o’clock violin lesson, directly followed by an hour long math tutor, and finally practicing his lines for the school play, *Hamlet*.

The young man is halfway to the station when he realizes he is five minute early. You would think that this would relax him, give him a moment of peace, but no. It only further increases his anxiety. Horrible thoughts of a broken train or a flooded tunnel fill his mind. He sits down, anxious beyond measure,and doesn't even notice the quarter fall from his pocket. He sees it, and upon realizing that it's his he springs up and walks towards it.

Too late however, a man bundled in various winter coats and another coat of grime bent down and grabbed it.

"Excuse me, sir," the boy says to the man.

The man walks on a if he hasn't heard him.

The boy repeats himself, louder than before, "Excuse me, sir!"

The man stops and looks behind, giving the sense that he has not heard the boy yet another, more subliminal sense, suggesting that he had.

"What is it you want, boy?" The man gives him a hard stare, as if daring him to say more.

The boy stutters, "I, um, the coin, it's um, mine could I-".

The man snaps at him, "Cut to the chase, boy! You won't get anywhere with that second-guessing cinder block up there between your shoulders!"

"I'm sorry sir, it's just that coin you picked up from the ground, it' mine."

The man offers sarcasm, "Well, such a *strong-minded* individual such as yourself who *obviously* shows very *plain* leadership qualities ought to have everything that is rightfully his, shouldn't he?" The man tosses the coin into the boy's outstretched hand and turns away.

The boy knows he shouldn't interfere with the man anymore, he was an odd type and gave him a bad feeling, but his attitude perplexed him more than anything and he wanted to know more.

"Excuse me, sir!", he calls out once more.

The man turns back, a look of vexation crossing his face.

"What is it you want now boy, is it the dollar I have hidden up my sleeve, or maybe the roll of dimes in my coat pocket?"

"No sir, I'm sorry for asking, but what is it that has you so flustered?"

"Flustered! I said nothing that implied my being flustered! What makes you assume that?"

"It's just, you seemed very cross at departing with that coin and-"

"I wasn't cross with the *coin*, I was cross with *you*, boy!"

"What have I done to offend you?", said the boy, trying not to express his own offense.

"You don't have the right look about you boy. Your gait's hurried, your fingers are restless, and your voice box's barely flickering with power."

"Why is that a problem, sir?"

"See, look at that! You're supposed to get up in my face, show some anger, something! Who taught you to be so soft-spoken?"

"Well, my parents taught me the rules, and I follow them in school."

"That's *despicable*! Tell me, boy, what happens if you do follow these *rules*?"

"Well, I've been told I'll have a happy life with a good job and lots of money." The whole time the boy has stared into space, hardly blinking.

"Lies!", the man shouts, "I'll tell you something, boy, not because I want to, but because you need to hear it."

"What is it then?"

"You're working for an empty cause. The lies they tell you is to keep your potential hidden, to make sure you work for them, not vice versa. You busy a lot?"

The boy nods.

"Just as I thought, they're really distractions. Who really cares if you can play Beethoven's 5th, can you choose between right and wrong. Can you see that there is something beyond what you know, something greater that valedictorians and diplomas, or will you live your life as another worthless human being?"

The boy is startled. Things are starting to make sense. "I'm afraid I don't quite follow you, sir."

"Tell me boy, do you do the things you do because you want to or because of this better life thing?"

The boy is too stunned to speak.

"It's like a modern *carpe diem*, boy. Every day wasted is a day you gave to them, do you want to continue to live like this?"

The boy shakes his head no.

"Neither do I, boy. But you're younger than me. You have a better chance at bringing about the change than I do. We cannot have these ideals yet, we have to work towards them, and maybe one day we will amount to something."

"I'm sorry, who's "we"?"

That moment his subway rolls into the station. The man smiles at him. "Remember what I said."

The boy gets into the subway. He turns back to get a glimpse of the man. He does. He also notices a tattoo on his arm that he didn't notice before. An "A" with a circle around it. Then the man vanishes from sight, into the crowd.

The boy sits down and opens his backpack. In it, along with it's previous contents, is a bunch of papers stapled together, a book called *Against the Logic of Submission* by Wolfi Landstreicher. IT looks as though it was printed by a home printer. The boy begins to flip through it when he notices a piece of lined paper, poorly torn out of a notebook, probably. It has one simple address: 818 SW 3rd Ave., PMB 1237 Portland, OR 97217.

With the address and the papers the boy slowly begins to awaken over the next few weeks. He realizes to the full extent what the man was saying. He begins a plan.

He leads the revolution.

title: The Beginning

question: What does the story say about the qualities that make a good student?

answer: No answer

critique: The response misses to provide an answer to the task.

critique: The response misses to mention that the boy is a good student because he follows the rules and is soft-spoken.

critique: The boy is a good student because he follows the rules set by his parents and teachers. He has a happy life with a good job and lots of money.

question: What does the text say about the old man?

answer: The old man is a mysterious man who seems to know a lot about the boy. He seems to know the boy's schedule, and he knows that the boy is going to a violin lesson, a math tutor, and a school play. The old man also knows that the boy is following the rules, and he thinks that the boy is working for an empty cause. The old man tells the boy that he has a better chance at bringing about change than he does. The old man also seems to know a lot about the boy's schedule.

critique: The old man doesn't know the boy's schedule, but he knows what the boy is doing.

critique: It is incorrectly stated that the man knows what the narrator's schedule is like.

critique: The old man doesn't know the boy's schedule. He only knows the boy is busy.

critique: It's omitted that the old man is a anarchist who tries to convince the boy to lead a revolution.

critique: The old man doesn't know the boy's schedule, he knows the boy's life.

critique: The old man knows the boy's schedule because he has been following him.

critique: The old man doesn't know the boy's schedule. He knows the boy's schedule because he's following him.

critique: The old man doesn't know the boy's schedule. He just knows that the boy is going to a violin lesson, a math tutor, and a school play.

question: What does the story say about the old man's motives?

answer: The old man seems to be trying to convince the boy to not follow the rules. He tells the boy that the rules are lies to keep his potential hidden. He also tells the boy that he and the boy are working for an empty cause and that they are wasting their lives. The old man also tells the boy that he has a better chance at bringing about the change than he does.

critique: The old man's motives are not explicitly stated.

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critique: The old man is not trying to convince the boy to not follow the rules. He is trying to convince the boy to not follow the rules.

critique: The old man does not try to convince the boy to not follow the rules. He tells the boy that the rules are lies to keep his potential hidden. He also tells the boy that he and the boy are working for an empty cause and that they are wasting their lives. The old man also tells the boy that he has a better chance at bringing about the change than he does.

critique: The old man is never identified as the "old man".

question: What does the story say about what the revolution was all about?

answer: No answer

critique: The response misses to answer the question and needs to be re-written.

critique: The answer should mention the book the boy finds in his backpack.


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ERWIN JAMES MONAHAN (born 1957) is a convicted murderer and has been a contributor and columnist for _The Guardian_ since 1998, writing under the name “Erwin James”. He was released in August 2004 having served 20 years of a life sentence.[1][2] From 2000 he wrote a regular column about prison life entitled _A Life Inside_. It was the first column of its kind in the history of British journalism. He has continued to write for the national press and is the editor-in-chief of _Inside Time_, a national newspaper in the UK for people in prison, as well as doing charity work, since his release. While he was in prison he did not receive fees for his articles; instead these were paid to a charity, the Prisoners' Advice Service, which had helped him.[3]

Background

Monahan's mother died in a car crash when he was seven, he was separated from his sister when she was twenty months old. Following the crash his grieving father turned to alcohol and became a violent drunk, inflicting much of his angst on his subsequent partners and on the young Erwin. Monahan committed his first crime when he was ten, breaking into a sweet shop. He eventually notched up 53 criminal convictions, including for burglary, theft, criminal damage, assault and mugging and including the final two for murder for which he was sentenced to life imprisonment.

Monahan and his co-defendant, William Ross, whom he had met in a squat in London, were convicted of murdering theatrical agent Greville Hallam and solicitor Angus Cochran in 1982. Hallam was found strangled in his home in London. Cochran was murdered three months later after being mugged. Following the murders Monahan fled to France and joined the French Foreign Legion, serving in Corsica and Africa. After receiving information from Ross, Monahan was traced by Scotland Yard, and in August 1984 he handed himself in to the British Consul in Nice.

Monahan and Ross both pleaded not guilty to murder on both charges, each blaming the other for the killings. Another man implicated in the murders, Paul Dunwell, avoided prosecution by agreeing to give evidence for the prosecution against the pair. Justice Otton, who presided over the case, described Monahan as “brutal, vicious and callous” and sentenced him to life imprisonment with a minimum term of 14 years, subsequently increased to 25 years by the Home Secretary.[4] Ross was also sentenced to life imprisonment; he was released from prison to a hostel in March 2014.

In January 2006, Monahan wrote an article for _G2_, a section of _The Guardian_ (as “Erwin James”, as always), recalling his time in the French Foreign Legion.[5] In 2009 he admitted that part of the article contained information detailing experiences in Beirut which were untrue, as he had not, in fact, served there.[6]

For the majority of the time during which he wrote for _The Guardian_ the circumstances leading to his arrests and convictions were not revealed, but in April 2009 Monahan's full name became public.[7]

Monahan wrote in _G2_ in April 2009 that his behaviour had been unforgivable and that “I seek no forgiveness now.”[8]

Published works

-   _A Life Inside: A Prisoner's Notebook_ (2003)
-   _The Home Stretch: From Prison to Parole_ (2005)
-   _Redeemable: A Memoir of Darkness and Hope_ (2016)

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question: What does the article say about Monahan's conviction?

answer: Monahan was convicted of murdering Greville Hallam and Angus Cochran. He was sentenced to life imprisonment with a minimum term of 14 years, which was increased to 25 years by the Home Secretary. He was released in August 2004 after serving 20 years of his sentence.

critique: The answer should mention that Monahan was also convicted of 53 other crimes.

critique: The answer should mention that Monahan was convicted of 53 crimes.

critique: The answer omits that Monahan and his co-defendant are convicted of the same charges, and that Ross later served his prison sentence.

question: What does the article say about Monahan's column for The Guardian?

answer: Monahan was a convicted murderer who wrote for The Guardian under the name "Erwin James". He wrote a column about prison life entitled "A Life Inside" which was the first of its kind in the history of British journalism. He has continued to write for the national press and is the editor-in-chief of Inside Time, a national newspaper in the UK for people in prison, as well as doing charity work, since his release. While he was in prison he did not receive fees for his articles; instead these were paid to a charity, the Prisoners' Advice Service, which had helped him.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

question: What does the article say about Monahan's youth?

answer: Monahan's mother died in a car crash when he was seven. Following the crash, his father became a violent drunk, inflicting much of his angst on his subsequent partners and on the young Erwin. Monahan committed his first crime when he was ten, breaking into a sweet shop.

critique: It is omitted that Monahan was separated from his sister when she was twenty months old.

critique: "first crime" - remove to improve readability; add "crime" before "sweet shop"

critique: The answer should mention that Monahan was separated from his sister when she was twenty months old.

critique: Monahan's father's behavior is irrelevant

question: What does the article say about Monahan's family life since prison?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that Monahan has a sister.

critique: The response is incorrect. The article states that Monahan's sister was separated from him when she was 20 months old.

critique: The answer is incorrect. Monahan's family life after prison is not discussed in the article.

critique: The information is available in the article.

critique: The answer should mention that Monahan's sister died in a car crash when she was 20 months old.

critique: The answer should mention that Monahan's sister was separated from him when she was 20 months old.

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So this is the first time I've ever written any fiction. The story, well it isn't really a story, it's kind of an opening or just me playing around. Have a look and tell me if my style of writing is ok or any tips for just starting out? Cheers :)
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It was a grey and miserable Saturday afternoon. It had been raining all morning and the sun had yet to make a real appearance. In Trafalgar square there were thousands gathered, crowding around the monuments and spilling out into nearby streets. Although this was the largest protest currently going on in the UK similar scenes could be seen in more than thirty cities nationwide. Near the front of the loud, chanting and aggravated crowd was a girl displaying all three of these with what seemed like as much vigour as the rest of the crowd combined. The rain ran off her hair, down her face and dripped from her chin; she had been outside since dawn and was freezing. Lucinda, as her mother called her, or Lucy as her friends called her, was wearing a long white coat with fur around the hood. It was zipped up against the strong winds and went to just above her knees, below that were skinny jeans and then bright red Converse trainers. Her face was made-up but only subtly focusing mainly on her eyes and she wore only one piece of jewellery: a thin chain with a pendant representing a double-thumbed fist clenching a Peyote button, a symbol popularised by her favourite author at the time.
Lucy stood with her placard held high, a hand written message on a large white board glued to an old table leg she had found in her garage and held with both hands. On the board was a potent slogan which could have been seen for the past year or so on bus stops, on billboards or broadcast on television, certain YouTube channels and blogs. The slogan was simply: ‘Talent is earned, not bought’. This was a protest against a relatively recent trend which saw people pay for a procedure which altered their genes and improved them in almost any area they wished.

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In the year 2022 a company which developed from a subsidiary of a large pharmaceutical company focused on gene therapy to prevent and cure a range of genetic diseases stumbled upon a method to replace the current DNA in a person with other DNA. And separately, a different part of the company worked with a method to alter and splice current genes together. These methods combined allowed Aspire Inc. to improve the physical characteristics of a person to that of the current best person whose genes they were able to get access to. Of course they would only have the potential of that person and would still have to train to improve whatever skill they required. These abilities ranged from becoming physically stronger or being able to run more quickly to having a better memory or being exceptional at mathematics. The methods used remain the property of Aspire Inc. entirely.
By 2030 this process had been all but perfected and the company had hundreds of thousands of genes available to choose from to improve whomever they wished in whatever way they wished. Testing had proven safe and it was a matter of months before the process, known colloquially as ‘bettering yourself’, was commercially available. Initially the idea was praised and lauded by the population as one which would be the next great leap in human advancement since the internet. By the year 2032 there were two clinics in the world, one in London and one in New York, where a person could book an appointment, pay £100,000 per trait, and be seen and finished within 24 weeks. Depending on popularity, Aspire Inc. were planning to build more clinics worldwide. Their treatment was very popular, for those who could afford it.

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title: Never written fiction before. How's my style? (600 words)

question: Summarize the themes of this story.

answer: The theme of this story is the use of technology to improve people. The story takes place in the year 2022, when a company discovers a way to replace DNA in humans. The company then uses this technology to improve people in a variety of ways. The story also touches on the theme of greed, as the people who can afford this technology are the only ones who can access it.

critique: The answer should mention that the story is set in the future.

critique: The answer should mention that the theme is also about social inequality.

critique: The story does not touch on the theme of greed.

question: Summarize how Lucy specifically comes into play in this story.

answer: Lucy is standing in a crowd of thousands in Trafalgar Square holding a placard with a hand-written slogan that is a protest against the recent trend of people paying for a procedure that alters their genes and improves them in almost any area they wish.

critique: The answer should mention that Lucy is protesting against the procedure because she believes talent is earned, not bought.

critique: The answer should mention that Lucy is protesting against Aspire Inc.

critique: This is not a summary of how Lucy comes into play. It's a summary of the main plot of the story.

critique: "Lucy is standing in a crowd of thousands in Trafalgar Square holding a placard with a hand-written slogan that is a protest against the recent trend of people paying for a procedure that alters their genes and improves them in almost any area they wish." - this is incorrect. Lucy is protesting the recent trend of people paying for a procedure that alters their genes and improves them in almost any area they wish.

critique: It's omitted that Lucy is protesting against Aspire Inc.

critique: The response only covers a factoid about Lucy.

critique: The answer should mention that Lucy's genes are altered.

question: Summarize the source of tension in the story.

answer: The source of tension in the story is the fact that people are paying for a procedure that alters their genes and improves them in almost any area they wish.

critique: This response does not clearly provide the history or how much tension is in the story.


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[Detail of a Cullercoats fishlass, from _Inside the Bar_, by Winslow Homer 1883]

A FISHWIFE, FISH-FAG[1] or FISHLASS is a woman who sells fish.[2]

Often the wives and daughters of fishermen, fishwives were notoriously loud and foul-mouthed, as noted in the expression, _To swear like a fishwife_. One reason for their outspokenness is that their wares were highly perishable and so lost value if not sold quickly.[3] Fishwives in fishing villages such as Cullercoats and Newhaven were noted for their beauty, hardiness and industry and were celebrated by artists and royalty.

In this context, the word _wife_ means _woman_ rather than _married woman_.[4] This usage stems from Old English _wif_ (woman) and is cognate with the German _Weib_ and the Dutch _Wijf_, also meaning “woman” (nowadays rarely used and usually in a pejorative sense).

Billingsgate

[Isaac Cruikshank's 1805 political cartoon, _A New Catamaran Expedition!!!_]

London's traditional fish market was frequented by such types who were known as “_the wives of Billingsgate_”. “_They dressed in strong 'stuff' gowns and quilted petticoats; their hair, caps and bonnets were flattened into one indistinguishable mass upon their heads. ... They smoked small pipes of tobacco, took snuff, drank gin and were known for their colourful language._”[5]

In the 18th century, fishwives frequently appeared in satires as fearsome scourges of fops and foreigners. Their vigorous and decisive mien was contrasted with that of politicians who were, by contrast, portrayed as vacillating and weak. For example, in Isaac Cruikshank's _A New Catamaran Expedition!!!_, a fleet of Billingsgate fishwives sails across the English Channel to terrorise the French and shame the British Prime Minister Pitt for his inaction.[6]

Cullercoats

William Finden noted, in 1842, that the wives and daughters of the Cullercoats fishermen searched for the bait, digging sand-worms, gathering mussels or seeking limpets and dog-crabs. They also assisted in baiting the hooks. In addition to this, they carried the fish to the market to sell them. “When fish are scarce, they not unfrequently carried a load on their shoulders, weighing between , to Newcastle, which is about ten miles distant from Cullercoats, in the hope of meeting with a better market.”[7]

Edward Corvan wrote and performed a popular music hall song about the Cullercoats Fish Lass in 1862:[8]

    Aw's a Cullercoats fish-lass, se cozy an' free
    Browt up in a cottage close on by the sea;
    An' aw sell fine fresh fish ti poor an' ti rich--
    Will ye buy, will ye buy, will ye buy maw fresh fish?

The Cullercoats Fishlass became a popular subject of American artist, Winslow Homer, who resided in the picturesque fishing village, to paint, from the spring of 1881 to November 1882. Homer soon became sensitive to the strenuous and courageous lives of its inhabitants, particularly the women, whom he depicted hauling and cleaning fish, mending nets, and, most poignantly, standing at the water's edge, awaiting the return of their men.

Jean F. Terry wrote, in 1913, "The Cullercoats fishwife, with her cheerful weather-bronzed face, her short jacket and ample skirts of blue flannel, and her heavily laden “creel” of fish is not only appreciated by the brotherhood of brush and pencil, but is one of the notable sights of the district".[9]

William S. Garson, in his 1935 book, _The Romance of Old Tynemouth and Cullercoats_, wrote: “The Cullercoats fishwife plays a man's part in helping to launch the lifeboat, frequently wading waist-high into furious and ice-cold waters, and she never hesitates to allow her man to take a place on the boat, though he may go to face death and disaster.”[10]

Newhaven

The Scottish fishwives of Newhaven had a reputation for their beauty and industry and so were celebrated by royalty — George IV and Queen Victoria. They were hard-bargainers though, and all the fishermen of the Firth of Forth brought their catches to Newhaven for the fishwives to sell in Edinburgh. The fishwives wore distinctive costumes of blue duffle coats covering layers of colourful striped petticoats with a muslin cap or other similar headdress. Their fish, such as haddock and herring, were carried on their backs in creels.[11]

India

This profession exists in India in modern times.[12][13]

Gallery

Image:fishwives baiting lines.jpg| Fishwives in St Andrews, Scotland bait their lines File:Bust of the 'Nairn Fishwife. - geograph.org.uk - 1530781.jpg| Statue of the Nairn Fishwife File:Adriaen van Ostade 009.jpg|_The fishwife_, Holland 1672 by Adriaen van Ostade File:Dollypeelportrait.jpg%7CNotorious Victorian fishwife Dolly Peel, of South Shields File:Alexander Ignatius Roche - A Newhaven Fishwife.jpg|Newhaven fishwife with creel (by Alexander Ignatius Roche 1861–1921) File:Fisher Jessie statue, Peterhead - geograph.org.uk - 1077905.jpg|Bronze cast statue of a fishwife and little girl, Peterhead File:William Hogarth - The Shrimp Girl - WGA11467.jpg|_The Shrimp Girl_ by William Hogarth, c. 1740-1745 File:Homer, Winslow - 'Fisherwomen, Cullercoats', 1881, graphite & watercolor on paper.jpg|_Fisherwomen, Cullercoats_, Winslow Homer 1881 File:Dorothy Pentreath.jpg|Dolly Pentreath (a Cornish fish jowster), in an engraved portrait published in 1781

Famous fishwives

-   Dolly Peel – a fishwife of South Shields
-   Dolly Pentreath – the last native speaker of Cornish
-   Marretje Arents – Dutch fishwife and rebel
-   Molly Malone – the subject of an Irish song
-   Annie Sandercock – the artist, dancer and celebrated wrestler.

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[7] _The Ports, Harbours, Watering-places and Picturesque Scenery of Great Britain_; Vol. 1, William Finden, 1842

[8] “The Cullercoats Fish Lass” Edward Corvan, 1862, in Allan's Illustrated Edition of Tyneside Songs and Readings 1891 1

[9] “Northumberland Yesterday and Today” 'Jean F Terry' 2 1913

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[13] https://web.archive.org/web/20190801222331/https://www.brettcolephotography.com/-/galleries/india/kolkata-calcutta/page/11

title: Fishwife

question: What is a fishwife?

answer: A fishwife is a woman who sells fish.

critique: It is omitted that fishwives were typically wives and daughters of fishermen.

critique: The answer should mention that the word "wife" in this context means "woman" rather than "married woman".

critique: The answer should mention the context in which the word is used.

critique: The answer should mention that fishwives are often the wives and daughters of fishermen.

critique: It is omitted that often the wives and daughters of fishermen.

question: What does the text say about the fish market?

answer: The fish market was frequented by fishwives, who were known as "the wives of Billingsgate". These women dressed in strong "stuff" gowns and quilted petticoats. They smoked small pipes of tobacco, took snuff, drank gin, and were known for their colorful language.

critique: It is omitted that in the 18th century, fishwives frequently appeared in satires as fearsome scourges of fops and foreigners.

critique: The answer omits the fishwives' reputation as fearsome scourges of fops and foreigners.

critique: The answer should mention the fishwives' reputation.

critique: The answer should mention the fishwives' reputation for being fierce.

critique: The fishwives were known for their colorful language, not the fish market.

critique: The answer can just describe the fishwives actually mentioned in the text.

critique: The answer omits the fishwives' reputation for being fearsome scourges of fops and foreigners.

question: What does the text say about William Finden?

answer: William Finden was a Newhaven fisherman. He gave an account of the wives and daughters of fishermen in Cullercoats. His work was quoted by Edward Corvan and Jean F. Terry.

critique: William Finden was recorded by Edward and Jean as well.remove the last two sentences of the answer as there isn't any information in the text to discriminate this on

critique: The answer could mention that Finden was a writer.

critique: The answer omits that Finden was a writer.

critique: The response inaccurately mentions that Finden was a Newhaven fisherman. However, Finden was noted for his writings about the Cullercoats fisherwives.

critique: The response is missing an important detail about Finden.

question: What does the text say about Newhaven?

answer: Newhaven is a Scottish fishing village. The fishwives of Newhaven had a reputation for their beauty and industry and were celebrated by royalty. The fishwives wore distinctive costumes of blue duffle coats. Their fish, such as haddock and herring, were carried on their backs in creels.

critique: The answer should mention George IV and Queen Victoria.

critique: The response is missing a few details about Newhaven.

critique: It's omitted that the Scottish fishwives were hard-bargainers.

critique: The text doesn't say anything about the fishwives' costumes.

critique: The answer could mention George IV and Queen Victoria.

critique: The answer omits that the fishwives of Newhaven were hard-bargainers.


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It has taken more than 3 decades for 3D printing technology to rise from its slumber, ever since Chuck Hall, in 1983, invented this simple and unconventional way of making objects. Yes, it may come as a shock to many that the “latest” craze in tech circles, 3D printing aka additive manufacturing (AM) is more than 30 years old technology.

In the last 5 years, the IoT (Internet of things) movement has led to a great awareness of this intriguing field which is poised to disrupt the future. Let’s explore the fascinating possibilities of what 3D printing can do and affect our mainstream life as we look at the road ahead.

In a recent PwC survey of more than 100 industrial manufacturers, two-thirds of them were already using 3D printing.

This number is bound to rise with companies like HP, Boeing and GE leading from the front.

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_(The graph above has been sourced via Google search)_

MEDICAL – BODY PARTS

3D printing of precise custom fit artificial prosthesis is a well established concept over the last decade and has been used in orthopedic, craniofacial and dental field. Currently, great progress has been made in making actual body parts and scaffolds (into which stem cells can grow).

3D printed kidneys, liver cells, blood vessels, skin and bone structure would find applications in actual surgery use and we will see patients walking with live body parts that are custom manufactured for them.

3D printed cadavers will make medical education easy and remove ethico-legal issues of procuring study material in anatomy. Drugs would be tested on 3D printed live tissues and eliminate the ongoing ethical debate over animals being used for testing of medicines.

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_(Publicly available Deloitte report on Industry where 3D printing technology is used – October 2014)_

AEROSPACE

GE, Boeing and BMW are already using 3D printed parts which have brought down production costs, are lighter in weight and have better fuel efficiency.

Future space expeditions would allow astronauts to carry 3D printers on space shuttles that would enable quick printing of any part that needs to be repaired on the shuttle itself instead of carrying along a huge repository of spare parts.

Lunar mining, a hypothetical idea may enable us to send large 3D printers in space which would harness the lunar soil as raw material and actually form terra for human colonization for the future.

FOOD

NASA is working on an idea to prepare food on board with the help of 3D printers to feed astronauts and offer them a more robust choice on the long voyages.

There is already a lot of competition in 3D printed chocolates and recently Hershey has announced a partnership with 3D systems to create unique custom made confectioneries.  Bio fabrication is the concept of replicating animal cells to, in essence, 'build' edible meat. Currently PETA (People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals) is very much on board with the idea.

It has sponsored a contest to award $1 million to the first scientist to produce and bring to market in-vitro chicken meat.

3D PRINTED HOUSES

China has already created the world largest 3D printed villa and multi storied apartment – which was 3D printed in quick time. This opens up possibilities of on-site construction of low income, mass scale housing for the developing nations.

3D PRINTED ELECTRONICS

Integrating grapheme with plastics and custom manufacturing would lead to new generation of integrated circuits and conductors and ushering in a new generation of customized Nano-electronics.

3D PRINTED DRONES

When two leading technologies combine, the results are astonishing. Southampton university has developed a drone – UAV – unmanned aerial vehicle, that can travel at 9 miles an hour and can be assembled in 10 minutes and remain in air for 30 minutes. It is light weight, strong and can be printed out in a few days. It has large scale applications for deliveries and aerial surveillance in rescue operations, natural calamities and terror operations situations.

3D PRINTED STYLE STATEMENTS

Fashion industry would undergo a sea change as it sits on a cusp of design revolution today. Full functional 3D printed clothing and accessories like custom fit shoes which reflect your unique style and personality would be mainstream. Personalized jeweler and bespoke products befitting an occasion or a personal style statement would make us more unique than what we are. Musical instruments like guitar, flute and violin would be fully functional and can be custom designed showcasing your creativity.

3D CLONES OF YOU

The ultimate vanity, the most personal gift item is a 3D selfie – a fully coloured (in 6 million colors) miniature version of you in your unique signature pose. These mini figurines are taking the consumer market by storm and will disrupt the corporate gifting market. People would not print photographs but would actually preserve moments in 3D as souvenirs and hold onto their memories, literally!

Combining the exciting possibilities of this technology with the comfort of home online shopping (Gartner- top USA consulting firm predicts that more and more companies would sell 3D printed parts online), at present there are 7 major players offering products through e-com portal.

The future of this technology is definitely optimistic, favorable and boundless!

question: What does the article say about novel applications of 3D printing?

answer: No answer

critique: The article lists a variety of novel applications of 3D printing.

critique: The answer should mention the applications mentioned in the article.

critique: The response misses to mention the applications of 3D printing.

critique: The answer should mention the applications listed in the text.

critique: The answer should mention some of the applications mentioned in the article.

question: Summarize the negative aspects of 3D printing.

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that there are no negative aspects listed in the text.

critique: The article does not mention any negative aspects of 3D printing.


text:
As the saying goes “make do and mend!” I’m a firm believer in up-cycling tired & unwanted furniture, rather than buying new.  With a little bit of graft – probably a lot of sanding – you can customize your own unique piece of furniture.  As a guide here is a sideboard I recently up-cycled for a client.

[how to shabby chic - sideboard ready to be upcycled]

Once you have your chosen piece of furniture, you will need to prep the surfaces to be painted. First be sure to remove any handles, hinges or metalwork. You’re now ready to start stripping the paint or varnish, to do this I tend to use sandpaper or Nitromors. I find both methods are equally effective and take the same amount of time, but when working with heavy detail Nitromors is best. Nitromors is a chemical substance that removes paint, varnish and SKIN, so do be careful and wear protective clothing & work in a well ventilated area.

[shabby chic furniture painting]

Once the item has been stripped and sanded, get rid of any dust by wiping it down with warm water – allow to dry.  A little tip for you; in my photo you will see my dog Ted happily snoozing, make sure when painting that animals stay well away! Their hair will get into the paint and on to your furniture – not a good look!  I also avoid painting outside on a sunny day as bugs find the gleam of the fresh wet paint extremely inviting. Once they bugs have landed they don’t come off without a little help.. this will leave marks.

[how to shabby chic]

Primer.. I don’t always use primer but depending on the condition of the wood it is sometimes necessary.  This particular sideboard is in a good condition, so instead of a primer I will be apply two coats of white.  I like to use Farrow & Ball paints; for this sideboard I am using Matchstick White as an undercoat, and an Eggshell Pavilion Grey for the topcoat (oil-based eggshells or matt paints are best as a water-based paint won’t sand as well).  When applying the paint always go in the direction of the wood grain, keeping minimal paint on the paintbrush & with nice thin layer.  It’s quality, not quantity.

[how to shabby chic]

Allow each layer of paint to dry properly before adding the next.  This photo is after one layer of Matchstick White. Keep applying even layers.

[how to shabby chic]

This sideboard has now had two layers of Matchstick White and two layers of Pavilion grey. I added in some standard black paint to darken the Pavilion grey as it was paler than my client wanted. I tend to leave the piece to thoroughly dry for a minimum of 24 hours before distressing.  Some people do not like the distressed look, so you could always leave it as above and just add a varnish or wax to protect the paint.

[how to shabby chic]

When distressing the furniture, there are so many routes and degrees of “aging” that you can do.  As this piece is a commission I’ve been asked to not go too crazy, just highlight on areas where, wear and tear would occur. For instance this would be on raised areas, edges, around drawers, handles & the top of detailing. To distress I use 180 grit sandpaper, the trick is to sand in one direction repeatedly. If you want to create extra damage and bruise the furniture, use metal chain or the edge of metal tools to beat the furniture.  I don’t do this often as I feel it’s fairly sacrilege & most often the antiques I paint are well used and slightly battered.

[how to shabby chic - the finished result]

Once you’re content with the finish, you can either leave as is, or add a coat of beeswax or varnish. This will help protect the wood, but don’t be too overzealous as an overly shiny varnish will not look authentic and shabby chic! If you have any questions or want further tips, please do not hesitate to email me.

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question: What does the text say about customizing used furniture?

answer: The author believes in up-cycling used furniture rather than buying new. They say that with a little bit of graft, you can customize your own unique piece of furniture. The author gives a guide for how to do this.

critique: The answer should mention the steps involved.

critique: The author gives a guide for how to customize furniture.

critique: Mention the advice about upcycling any furniture.

critique: The answer should mention the need for sanding.

critique: It is omitted that to do this, the surface must be prepped before painting.


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I am trying to be a writer, I would like opinions.  Feel free to be as harsh or as flattering as you want, in my eyes its all constructive.  It might be a bit hard to figure out, so I guess also comment on what you think its about.

	The lights were flickering on and off.  He came into view three or four times.  Large bursts of light erupting from a pitch black abyss.  In the room, there were no sounds, no breaths, no heart beats.  When the lights were on the black abyss turned into a room, and the room was all white with blisteringly powerful light spraying off everywhere.  When the lights turned on, maybe a half a second, maybe three quarters, I was able to make out a figure.  Large, dark and angry.  Eyes completely yellow, staring me down.  My eyes reflected in his, the reflection so bright, how could I possibly look away.  I shoved my hands against my temples and squeezed, the man falling in and out of my sight.  The light turned off, a wave of black falling over me, like a midnight black blanket being wrapped around my head on a bright day.  I fell over slightly and felt nauseous.  I tripped on my own feet and my head banged against the floor, or the wall, I’m not really sure which.  At times like these I always ran to the door, kicking and screaming to let me out, to let me breathe, but I always heard the same words every time I banged the door, “anesthesia.”  I would loose track of the door at that point.  First it was on the left, then it was on the right.  Rotating around me like the orbit of a moon sped up.
	They would always turn the lights on at the worst moment, right when I would close my eyes, right when I was going to get some rest finally.  I was a child waiting for a Christmas that never came.  Sometimes, during these fits of light, I would catch the faint glimmer of a shadow over me.  The shadow of a demon like being with the horns of a devil and the knife of a butcher.  Picking and pulling at my well being, the chords of thought being plucked right from under me.  I was never able to move at these moments, never able to reach out my hand and grasp the ephemeral hand over me.  The lights started to flicker again, in and out.  If I was a bucket of sand, they would be emptying me gradually, and each grain of sand that would fall out would just disappear as it left the bucket, with each flicker of the light this would continue to happen.  The bang and the light coming and going from those in front of me who were never actually in front of me.  A worthless fight.
	How long has it been?  A week?  A month?  I’d bang on the door when I could find it.  I’d yell my name just to yell it, just to gain something from a lost experience, right up until that was lost too.  And when I’d yell, I’d cry, because I was yelling my life, my upbringing, my experiences.  After each yell, it would go, after each cry I’d forget.  And on that final day, when there was nothing left to yell, I’d wake up.
	I would wake up lying down, people in white standing over me with light shining down and red tools lying next to me.  Everything is in front of me, but I cant grasp it.  Like a fisherman trying to grab the reflection of a fish going by with his bare hands.  Except now, I am all empty.

title: This is my story (read and criticize)

question: What does the story say about what the narrator is battling?

answer: The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them.

critique: The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them.

critique: "The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them." - these sentences are inaccurate and redundant. The narrator already described the entity as a demon.

critique: The narrator is not battling a physical entity, but a mental one.

critique: The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take the narrator's life away from them. The narrator is battling with what seems to be a physical entity. The entity is described as dark and angry and the narrator sees it as a demon. The entity seems to be the narrator's enemy and is trying to take

critique: The narrator is not battling with an entity.