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His feverish yelling reverberated around me, bouncing mercilessly from dark surface to dark surface - A primal voice crying out again into the black accompanying his physical efforts.

My mind ached as my bloodied ears received the sound. This intolerable pain was increasing immeasurably by the floods of adrenaline that followed the icy jolt of anxiety ripping up through my spine. I cursed my claustrophobia; the room could not have been more than two meters wide, and just over that again in length. In addition to my tight bindings, the shuddering echoes of exhaustion and ragged laughter jumping out from all around me were like cold, violating hands pinching roughly at my clammy slack skin.

Most of my tension had left me now. Fatigue and a growing complacency with my situation had led me to be absurdly relaxed under the coming blows - or perhaps I had just started to feel numb with shock - perhaps my brain had just become too occupied with pain.

A sudden rush of air came from my right, gushing past my cheek. My head flew back and a muted yet moist 'thach' ricocheted off the walls. Strangely my head began to hurt before my face did. I started feeling a strong urge to vomit, as I used what always seemed to feel like the last few bare threads of my energy to pull my head forwards again. As I did, my eyes feel closed in sync, like a child's toy doll.

"I hope you feel that"

My eyes snapped open and my brain, which had been teetering on the edge of unconsciousness, was now utterly alert.

"I hope you fuckin' feel that"

It was the first time he'd spoken - I was so amazed and fearful that the moment might would be lost that I gurgled on my own blood in my excitement to try to engage him. Quickly I tried to clear my throat, but my swollen face and knotted muscles wouldn't comply, so I ended up gnashing and fizzing the blood against my teeth in my derangement.

Coagulated blood was forced through the small gaps in my teeth and spat from the slit I had left for a mouth; I heard loud heavy droplets hit the smooth floor in front of me as the blood mingled slobber crept down my chin.

Naturally when I first woke here and we started this, I cried and screamed and begged for a reason - or even a response - to the blow after blow. The questions burning in my mind as each skin on skin assault left a smoldering ember of hope in me that, maybe, I could feel even just a small crumb of humanity from my assailant. Some leverage.

I started choking - the thick blood in my throat started gushing into my lungs. In my haste I must have opened some internal wound. Every painful quake of my chest, as I desperately clambered for air, seemed to satisfy him.

"Fucking good."

I was seized with terror as I knew he was closing away again - I tried one last staggered attempt to speak with everything I had left. It tore from my larynx like it was wrapped in sandpaper;

"Why"

At this point I didn't even know if it was a question.

In the gloom I just made out his silhouette. He was standing at 90 degree angle facing away from me, I couldn't tell in what direction. My eyes were almost swollen shut so I could hardly ever decipher his proximity from me; his thickness was the most I could manage. In mid-breath, I felt an overwhelmingly powerful slam to my sternum - so powerful the chair was hurled backwards and I felt the metal legs beneath bend as my propelled weight hurled into them at such an angle. I thought they'd broken off as I tipped pathetically to the ground. Due to the confinement, my skull cracked loudly against the wall first, followed by the quiet slap of my body against the damp concrete of the floor.

The pressure in my head was then too much and was released as I convulsed to vomit, violently enough, as fortune had it, to force my solid jaw apart. Just as I started to pass out, I heard a satisfied grunt from the abyss.

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**EDIT** : Anyone who's taken the time to read this, I'd really appreciate some feedback.

title: Begging Stockholm

question: What does the story say about why the narrator is scared and in pain?

answer: The narrator finds themselves in a very small room, bound, with the sounds of a complete stranger's laughter echoing in the distance. The narrator is in a great amount of pain, and they are in an ungodly amount of fear. The stranger is speaking to the narrator and slamming their body against the walls, and their skull cracks loudly against the wall. Reduced to convulsing and vomiting, the narrator passes out.

critique: The answer contains inaccurate information.

critique: The narrator is not in pain because of the laughter.

critique: The narrator is not scared of the laughter, they are scared of the pain.

critique: The narrator is not in a great amount of fear.

critique: The narrator's name should be in the answer.

critique: The response is missing the part where the assailant beats the narrator.

question: What does the story say about why the narrator is beaten?

answer: No answer

critique: The entire story serves to answer this question.


split: train

text:
[Portrait of Ferry with King Stanisław Leszczyński.]

NICOLAS FERRY (known as BÉBÉ) (1741–1764) was a French dwarf who became renowned throughout Europe as the court dwarf of King Stanisław Leszczyński.

Early life and discovery

Nicolas Ferry was born on 14 October 1741 in Plaine, Bas-Rhin, France, the son of a farmer and his wife. He was unusually small at birth and continued to grow slowly, although all contemporary sources and surviving portraits agree that his limbs and features were in proportion to his height (“proportionate dwarfism”). His fame spread, and in 1746 he was visited by ladies from the court of Stanisław, who was also the Duke of Lorraine and maintained a court at Lunéville, although he was no longer King of Poland. Stanisław sent his physician to examine the child, who was now five years old and approximately 24 inches (60 cm) tall, and subsequently sent for him. He offered Ferry's parents money in return for their son, who was to be maintained and educated in the Leszczyński household as the court dwarf.

Life at court

At court Ferry quickly acquired the nickname Bébé (“Baby”). He was given to the queen as a birthday present in 1747, and, after her death in 1748, he became the property of her cousin, the Princesse de Talmont. He had tutors, but proved to be of relatively low intelligence and is reported never to have learned to read or write. A small wooden house was built for him in one of the halls of the Chateau de Lunéville, and he was spoiled and indulged by his master and the entire court. He played practical jokes on visitors and often behaved very badly, but he was the king's favourite and a great attraction.[1] Those entertained by his antics included the Duc du Richelieu and Voltaire.

In 1759 the Polish dwarf Józef Boruwłaski visited the court. He was a witty, urbane young man of 20, shorter than Ferry and well versed in court manners. Unflattering comparisons were drawn, and Ferry became so angry that he attacked Boruwłaski and tried to throw him onto the fire. The indulgent Stanisław ordered Ferry beaten for this outrage, reportedly to his severe shock and mortification.

Ferry was also compared unfavourably with Boruwłaski by the aristocratic writer, scientist and physician Louis-Élisabeth de La Vergne de Tressan, who visited the Lunéville court to receive an honour from Stanisław. De Tressan later delivered a paper to the French Academy of Sciences likening Ferry to an animal in comparison with the intelligent, well-educated Polish dwarf.

Ferry remained at Stanisław's court throughout his life, eventually growing to a height of 34 inches (86 cm).[2]

Decline and death

Ferry's health declined in his late teens. He developed a hunchback and had difficulty walking, and he suffered wasting of the soft tissues and signs of premature aging.[3] Eventually he became incontinent and a chronic invalid, and died on 8 June 1764 aged 22. His skeleton was prepared and mounted for study, and is currently kept at the Musée de l'Homme in Paris. The rest of his remains were buried in the church at Lunéville; when the church was destroyed during the French Revolution, Ferry's inscribed mausoleum was preserved and is now at the Chateau de Lunéville. Some of Ferry's outfits are preserved in the historical museum at Nancy and there are a number of wax statues of him still in existence. A unique Luneville Faience statue of Ferry, 22 inches (56 cm) tall, modelled from life, was kept at the Chateau de Lunéville, but was destroyed in a fire in 2003.[4]

In 2006 and 2008, French researchers published detailed studies of Ferry's skeletal remains, with particular attention to his jaws and facial bones. They concluded that Ferry suffered from a rare genetic form of primordial dwarfism characterised by small, abnormal teeth without roots, and dubbed the condition _NMOSR_.[5]

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[4] Foster, Kate (Lady Davson) (2004). IN MEMORIAM BÉBÉ alias Nicolas Ferry . _The French Porcelain Society Spring 2004 newsletter_, pp 26-29.

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title: Nicolas Ferry

question: Summarize the decline of Ferry's health.

answer: Ferry's health declined in his late teens and he developed a hunchback and was not able to walk well. His soft tissues wasted and he became an incontinent and chronic invalid. As a result, he slowly deteriorated, died in 1764 aged 22, and his remains were preserved.

critique: "slowly deteriorated, died in 1764 aged 22" - this is redundant and can be deleted.

critique: The answer could mention when Ferry died.

critique: The answer should mention that Ferry died in 1764.

critique: The response is missing the part about Ferry's death.

critique: The answer should mention that Ferry's health declined due to a rare genetic form of primordial dwarfism.

critique: "As a result, he slowly deteriorated, died in 1764 aged 22, and his remains were preserved." - this is incorrect. Ferry's health deteriorated in his late teens and he died in 1764 at the age of 22.

critique: "and his remains were preserved" - this is inaccurate. His remains were buried in the church at Lunéville.

critique: Unnecessary reference to the cause of Ferry's decline in his health.

question: Summarize the most interesting part of Ferry's life.

answer: The most interesting part of Ferry's life is when he was compared to a more physically endowed dwarf and how he reacted to that. Ferry's health declined in his early teens, lost teeth, developed a hunchback, became incontinent, etc. This was well before he was 22.

critique: "Ferry's health declined in his early teens, lost teeth, developed a hunchback, became incontinent, etc. This was well before he was 22." - this is irrelevant and should be removed.

critique: The answer should mention Ferry's age and how he died.

critique: The response is a bit confusing and hard to read.

critique: The most interesting part of Ferry's life was when he was compared to a more physically endowed dwarf and how he reacted to that.

text: The question is a subjective one, and cannot be answered clearly

category: other

refinement: The most interesting part of Ferry's life is when he was compared to a more physically endowed dwarf and how he reacted to that. Ferry's health declined in his early teens, lost teeth, developed a hunchback, became incontinent, etc. This was well before he was 22.

category_text: subjective question

question: Summarize how Ferry worked his way through the court.

answer: Dwarfism was a phenomenon in France in the 18th century and a French nobleman, King Stanis?aw Leszczy?ski, had a habit of pampering his court dwarves. The two were crowned King and Queen, dated a year later, and raised their court dwarves. The odd state of affairs was later exported to a Polish King and his court by way of a Spaniard named de Tressan. During a dinner, the Polish jokester realized the regal couple was out of commission and improvised in their stead, the tale of which then made record in an imperial courts' dinner journal in Spain.

critique: "Dwarfism was a phenomenon in France in the 18th century and a French nobleman, King Stanis?aw Leszczy?ski, had a habit of pampering his court dwarves. The two were crowned King and Queen, dated a year later, and raised their court dwarves. The odd state of affairs was later exported to a Polish King and his court by way of a Spaniard named de Tressan. During a dinner, the Polish jokester realized the regal couple was out of commission and improvised in their stead, the tale of which then made record in an imperial courts' dinner journal in Spain." - this is all made-up nonsense.

critique: "The two were crowned King and Queen, dated a year later, and raised their court dwarves. The odd state of affairs was later exported to a Polish King and his court by way of a Spaniard named de Tressan. During a dinner, the Polish jokester realized the regal couple was out of commission and improvised in their stead, the tale of which then made record in an imperial courts' dinner journal in Spain." - this is inaccurate. There was no mention of a Spanish dinner journal.

critique: This is not a summary but a series of events that did not happen.

critique: The response contains inaccurate information.

question: Summarize what this article says about how dwarves were regarded in 16th century Europe.

answer: No answer

critique: Despite the lack of an answer, the passage does contain several useful tidbits of information, including Ferry's own frustrations at how dwarves were regarded at the time.

critique: The article does not say anything about how dwarves were regarded in the 16th century.

critique: The response misses to provide an answer to the task.

critique: The response misses to answer the question.

critique: The response misses to answer the question completely.


text:
John Snatch. Given name: Johnny Snatch. John Snatch sounds more professional though.

John worked in an office downtown. The office was on the third floor of
what used to be a grain storage building or something like that. John didn't care too much for the specifics, and certainly didn't pay much attention during the tour on his first day. He didn't even know the name of the offices above and below his.

Like him, his coworkers were young subscribers to the current urban fads and had certain sensitivities to the nonchalant method of doing things. Indie music that wasn't so indie anymore could often be heard throughout his office. No one wore khakis to work. A generation with an appreciation for themselves.
	His job was relatively unimportant, but necessary nonetheless. John was a secretary, and had his explanation for the peculiar job down pat. "Just trying to break those gender barriers," John would say, adding in a half-hearted attempt at a laugh. The truth was that John didn't care much for any job he could occupy his time with. He saw a certain level of the superficial in just about everything he did now. A somewhat nihilistic and apathetic attitude embraced him most of the time. He didn't understand why everyone couldn't just slow down.

Our story sets its self on the twenty-fifth of September, a day with a temperature of about 60 degrees. John walked out of his measly apartment, a paperback book tucked under his arm and messenger bag over his shoulder. He wore a white oxford shirt with an olive green sweater vest on top -the sleeves were half rolled up his forearm- his pants were brown and his shoes a different shade of the color. John had not opened his red and white paper back book in three days, but carried it along with him in unrecognized hopes that he could tell someone about it. He was about half way through, and mildly enjoyed the story. John's vocabulary was wide enough to make the plot seem much more interesting that it was, anyways.

On the bus, John found the usual urge to listen to music off of his mobile phone absent. Today was an overcast day, a day to stare out of the window of your bus silently as if you're conceptualizing your new novel, or maybe considering the human condition by forcing the rain in to some complex metaphor for which it was never intended. John exited a stop early and unconsciously decided to not go in to work that day.

The stop happened to be in front of an old, yet hip (by the new definition) bookstore and coffee shop. John had never noticed it before, but ducked in for no particular reason. He ordered his coffee, a mocha, no whipped cream, and walked around the bookstore. John dodged the regular titles found at all stores that at least turn a regular profit, catering to the likes of teenagers that needed a copy of Crime and Punishment with a foreword that would write their reports for them. John immediately looked for the most dust covered shelf.

On it, John found an odd assortment of literature, they were not in alphabetical order, nor in any order of genre or style. Not by color, size, rating, rarity. Although, something about many of them spiked familiarity in John. He picked up a book titled "Amy Rhinehart, the girl." This was odd. The girl in cubicle twenty-two was named Amy Rhinehart. He guessed it was an odd enough named to be used in a book. He opened to the first page. "Amy Rhinehart was born on the seventeenth of June, 1982." John looked up from the book, starting in to the shelves who, if by some sort of magic could transform in to a mirror, John would have seen the most puzzled look that ever wrote itself upon a man's face. Amy Rhinehart -the real one, from the office- was born June 17, 1982. He had read it in a personnel file just a day before. Surely he had misread.

Nope. The paper in front of him still printed the same thing he had seen moments before. "Odd." John thought. He put the book on the shelf, not wanting to scare himself any farther. He scanned the rows again, and as if by some spell saw a book titled, "Rob Snatch." His father's name. John couldn't help but express his confusion audibly. John began to reach for the novel, but before his hand could grasp its target, his eye found a new obsession. "The Mild Adventures of Johnny Snatch."

John asked the price of the book. It wasn't for sale. John stared at the cover for a moment, and opened the cover with the anticipation of a pirate, finding his lost gold contained in a chest within the bowels of a cave. John saw no text in this book, instead, he found a pen secured in a cut out of the pages. He picked the pen up, and while examining it, did not notice that the cutout ceased to exist. John looked back at the book, his mind was as blank as the pages before him.

The book wasn't for sale.
John ran out of the store, book and all.
No one stopped him.

title: First short story, 'John.' Feedback is greatly appreciated!

question: Summarize surprises in the plot.

answer: John Snatch is a secretary in an office. He is a young man who is apathetic and nihilistic. He does not care much for his job. He is reading a book on the bus on his way to work. He gets off the bus at a stop in front of a bookstore and coffee shop. He goes in and browses the books. He finds a book about Amy Rhinehart, who is in his office. He finds a book about his father, Rob Snatch. He finds a book about himself, The Mild Adventures of Johnny Snatch. He is fascinated by the book and leaves the store with it.

critique: The answer should mention that the book is not for sale.

critique: There is a grammar issue with the third line of the second sentence. It should be "The"

critique: Does not mention the disappearing books.

critique: The answer omits that the book isn't for sale.

critique: John does not find a book about himself.

text: The answer should mention that the book he took from the bookshop was blank and has a pen secured in it.

category: coverage

question: Summarize how John Snatch changes over the course of the story.

answer: John Snatch is a young man who works in an office downtown. He has a relatively unimportant job, but he doesn't care much for it. He has a somewhat nihilistic and apathetic attitude. John Snatch is a young man who works in an office downtown. He has a relatively unimportant job, but he doesn't care much for it. He has a somewhat nihilistic and apathetic attitude.

critique: The text doesn't describe many sequential steps whereby the answer could iterate Snatch's progression. It simply implies that he finds a novel about himself and that is his notable change.

critique: The answer should mention the books he finds in the bookstore.

critique: The answer should mention that John Snatch is a secretary.

critique: John Snatch's job is irrelevant to the question.

question: Summarize the plot of the paperback John has tucked under his arm.

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the plot of the book is not mentioned.

question: What does the story say about John and his coworkers?

answer: John and his coworkers are young subscribers to current urban fads and have certain sensitivities to the nonchalant method of doing things. They listen to indie music that isn't indie anymore, and no one wears khakis to work. John is a secretary who says he is just trying to break gender barriers. He thinks his coworkers have a certain superficiality to everything they do.

critique: The first sentence is a bit confusing and in need of a rewrite.

critique: John doesn't think his coworkers have a certain superficiality, he just doesn't care much for his coworkers.


text:
The two soldiers briskly walked down the concrete semicircle of a hallway, one of many connecting the South Suffolk bunkers together. The roaring of Soviet bombs on the surface barely shook the underground structure, but those minor vibrations were enough so that everyone and everything was dusty-even the air was gray. The door at the end of the hallway was simply marked as “101.” One knocked, and the sound echoed through the hall. Quickly, a small latch was slid open, and a single blue eye looked them over, slid it back, and opened the door. The owner of the eye, a young private who would still be in high school if not for the ongoing conflict, saluted the two soldiers. Both returned it.

Inside, an old, grandfatherly man in a loud sweater with a long, white beard was listening to Christmas music. Upon seeing the entering soldiers, he shut off the state-issued radio. For all his apparent jovial nature, the room was darker and dustier than any other. None of the cleaners wanted to come in here, and when they did they attempted to clean it as fast as possible. With the radio off, it was easier to understand why.

The moaning.

It wasn’t loud. In fact, it was just barely audible, to the point where one wouldn’t notice it except with the lack of any other source of noise. The source was a pit with chains leading into it. Inside were but a few small children-or what the State had labeled as ‘The Plague of the Isles.’

Celts.

The old man interrupted the sound of the moaning, with a voice that was much like the soldiers had imagined Santa to sound like when they were but young children.

“Well? What has the Permanent Secretary sent you here for?” One of the soldiers-a young corporal with the name of Benjamin-spoke up.

“Project K6, sir.”

“What about it?”

“Is it ready for use?”

“I wouldn’t use it yet, though it can be tested.”

“Sir... The Soviets have breached the Bodicaea line. They’re less that 10 miles from the outskirts of London.”

“Yes, yes. I know that. But let me show you something.”

He waved them over to the pit. Looking down, they saw four emaciated children, chained together and to the walls.

The Captain spoke up. “Sir, I believe this could be counted as a success.”

The old man-Professor Herbert-looked at him with complete derision.

“Most of that is the joint effects of seeing their parents burnt alive and being underfed for the past month. K6 hasn't changed anything, as far as we know. Still, the rat experiments are promising.”

“Permanent Secretary Ottinger won’t be happy about this.”

“The problem is that we haven’t been given enough time. If you-”

“Sir, the State has given all the time it will. K6 is needed now!”

“I don’t think tha-”

“We are the embodiment of the will of the State, and if you do not follow our instructions, you are going against the State's own will. Hand K6 over.”

Professor Herbert sighed.

“Fine. Mark!”

The private at the door stood and walked to them.

“I want you to give these men... 4 vials of the K6 virus. As for you two,” he said, turning to the pair of soldiers. “I want you to inform the PS that this needs to be dropped far away from the Isles themselves. Berlin or Vienna will give us enough of a buffer that by the time the virus reaches us, if it actually infects anyone that is, we’ll be far enough away that we can successfully inoculate the Anglic population of the Isles.”

The Corporal smiled, giving an affirmative to the professor. “Remember, sir, it’s all for the best. Once the Communists and the Celts are destroyed, the State will thrive.”

“I suppose, but at what price prosperity?”

“Sir...”

“I know, I know. The hypocrisy is astounding. Ah, well, best not to think of it.”

The moans rose again from the pit with the ensuing silence.

“The State must thrive.” The professor saluted.

“The State must thrive.” The soldiers briskly exited.

Behind them, the moans were cut out by the sound of Christmas.

title: The State Must Thrive

question: What does the text say about reindeer?

answer: No answer

critique: There is no mention of reindeer in the story.

critique: While there is no direct mention of reindeer, the story refers to Santa, so in a way it does.

critique: Nothing in the text talks about reindeer or Santa.

critique: There is no mention of reindeer in the text.

question: What is the role of Christmas in the story?

answer: It is heard on the radio, and it is customary for the child characters to be in tears.

critique: "the child characters to be in tears." is inaccurate. The moaning is the sound of children in the pit.

critique: The radio was off and was only used for a second for the old man to flip it off

critique: Winter holidays are not mentioned in the story, Dr. Suess's "How the Grinch Stole Christmas" is mentioned as the professor telling the soldiers after the conversation that the children are getting their dose of the virus, "Happy Birthday!"

critique: The radio is not the only source of Christmas music

critique: The answer should mention the Christmas music is heard on the old man's radio.

critique: The last statement is inaccurate and should be removed.

critique: The radio is not playing Christmas music.

critique: It is implied that the children are in tears.

critique: The answer should mention the old man's Christmas sweater.

critique: The answer is not related to the question.


text:
This, this a story without a planned plot, protagonist, antagonist or even a climax at that. Why, do you ask? Leave it to personal opinion to tell you that life doesn't have a story line, a good guy, or a bad guy, and it could end mid sentence, or after three hundred pages. So with that said, meet Riley, Riley Mattheux. A quiet kid, with loud noises in his head. Didn't say a whole lot, but that doesn't mean he had nothing to say. He had a hard time speaking when put on the spot, driving peers and people affiliated with him absolutely crazy. He was gentleman, a little less of a scholar, and even less of a manly man. He would never break six foot tall, or know the luxury of having the opposite sex swoon over him. This is a transcript of my conversations with Riley, see how he starts off keeping to himself, and slowly opens up. I hope you all get to know him as well as i did.

Me: Good morning Riley, how are you doing this morning.

Riley: Im good.

Me: Just good?

Riley: Yeah.

Me: No elaboration on how well you slept or how the events of your morning affected your good mood?

Riley: Any elaboration on how much you really wanna psycho-analyze me for your putrid tests?

Me: All I asked is how your morning was...

Riley: And "good" wasnt good enough? You asked me a question, and i answered it, in a timely manner, and directly, what else do you want from me?

Me: Well, I would like to have a normal conversation, without the hostility, and without you looking to deep into implications that do not exist.

Riley: Okay then, continue.

Me: Well, what is it you like? Any hobbies, interests, passions?

Riley: Music is my passion.

Me: What kind of music do you enjoy?

Riley: I just said I love music, all music, there isn't a certain genre i love more than another, I appreciate art, I appreciate the emotions and the fullness of the heart that was poured into that little four minute composition. You can always tell a good song by how it makes you feel, it it doesnt make you feel anything, it's garbage. If you feel anger, sadness, happiness etc, then the artist has done what they were looking to do. Which is all anyone wants anyway, is the piece of mind know that they accomplished what they set out to do.

Me: Wow, i wasn't expecting an answer that in depth.

Riley: I'm an in depth guy.

Me: I'm starting to see that.

Riley: Well i would hope so, you got four sets of eyes there to see it with.

Me: Fair Enough. Im noticing that your answers to my questions are very black and white, is that how you view life?

Riley: As a matter of fact it is. It is yes or no, this or that, right or left, simple as that, when you start making things more complicated is when problems arise, whether it be a small or huge problem. Life isn't that hard of a thing to figure out, once you simplify it, all the complications become clear, still complex nonetheless. Its kinda like taking pre-calculus, you learn the hard complicated way to work all the problems out to get the same answer, as opposed to calculus, you learn why, instead of how, and sometimes knowing why is better than knowing how.

Me: So, you are saying that everything is black and white, but your explanations as to why that is so is all colors of the rainbow. If its so simple, why does it require explaining? If it were as cake as you say, it would just require common sense to understand that nothing is as hard as we make it?

Riley: Sense, is not a common thing anymore.

Me: Why do you say that?

Riley: What the hell do you mean, why do I say that? I say that because i believe it, if you have to ask, you are walking proof that sense is an uncommon trait.

Me: Anger, Riley, watch it, I'm asking you why you believe that common sense is a dying trait.

Riley: It doesnt matter why i believe anything, no one is going to care what i think. I tell you what though, if someone would just sit the fuck down, shut up, and listen, I have it figured out, as god as my witness, I have this life figured out, and how it works, and why it works, and why the path we are going down is gonna be the end, and a new beginning at the same time.

After that, Riley got worked up, and left the room. I personally believe i can break to the inner core of this kid, there is something interesting that i am seeing, and something even more interesting that i have yet to see. Is anyone else interested in my future conversations with Riley?

title: Emotions Overriding Configurations

question: Summarize the main point of the interview.

answer: The main point of the interview is to learn more about Riley. There isn't a plot to this story, and none of the events are of any significance or importance. The story's main talking point is Riley's thoughts and how the interview occurred.

critique: The story is not a transcript of the interview.

critique: The story is not a plotless interview. It is a story about Riley.

critique: The plot and the story's importance is irrelevant.

critique: "The main point of the interview is to learn more about Riley. There isn't a plot to this story, and none of the events are of any significance or importance. The story's main talking point is Riley's thoughts and how the interview occurred." - this is incorrect. The narrator is the one interviewing Riley and wants to learn more about him. The narrator also wants to know if anyone is interested in his future conversations with Riley.

critique: The answer is confusing and doesn't make sense.

critique: Note also about Riley keeping his thoughts to himself and how he opens up

text: The question asks about the interview, not the overall story.

question: Summarize what happens after Riley says that sense is no longer a common thing.

answer: The narrator asks him why he believes that, but the question is directed to Riley, who says that if you have to ask you are walking proof that sense is a dying trait. He gets worked up and leaves the room.

critique: The narrator is not asking Riley why he believes that sense is no longer common, but why he believes that common sense is a dying trait.

critique: The answer should mention that Riley's departure is the end of the story.

critique: The narrator is not asking Riley why he believes that sense is no longer a common thing.

critique: It is omitted that the narrator believes that she can break to the inner core of this kid.

text: "but the question is directed to Riley, who says that if you have to ask you are walking proof that sense is a dying trait," is incoherent and should be rewritten.

category: coherence

question: What does the story say about anger?

answer: Anger is a common thing in the world. Riley exhibits anger when being asked why he believes common sense is a dying trait. He believes the person who asks is walking proof that sense is an uncommon trait.

critique: The answer should mention that Riley is angry at the narrator.

critique: The answer should mention that Riley's anger is directed at the narrator.

critique: The response contains inaccurate information.

critique: "He believes the person who asks is walking proof that sense is an uncommon trait." - this is inaccurate. Riley just said that the person who asks is proof that common sense is a dying trait.

critique: The answer should mention Riley's outburst.

critique: "When being asked" - Riley's reaction isn't relevant

question: What does the story say about Riley's home life?

answer: No answer

critique: The passage states that Riley is a quiet kid with loud noises in his head.

critique: The question could be made clearer by being less vague and more directed.


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Every new technology causes initial public discomfort. It took society a long time to accept cell phones as commonplace. Before that, television. And before that, tractors.

So when people scoffed at Google Glass, I rolled my eyes. “Here we go again,” I thought. “Knee-jerk objection to new technology.”

The biggest concern seems to be distraction. Google Glass looks like a pair of glasses, minus the lenses; it's just a band across your forehead, with a tiny screen mounted at the upper-right side. By tapping the earpiece and using spoken commands, you direct it to do smartphone-ish tasks, such as fielding a calendar alert and finding a nearby sushi restaurant.

Just what we need, right? People reading texts and watching movies while they drive and attaining new heights of rudeness by scanning their e-mail during face-to-face conversation.

Those are misguided concerns. When I finally got to try Google Glass, I realized that they don't put anything in front of your eyes. You still make eye contact when you talk. You still see the road ahead. The screen is so tiny, it doesn't block your normal vision.

Hilarious parody videos show people undergoing all kinds of injury while peering at the world through a screen cluttered with alerts and ads. But that's not quite how it works. You glance up now and then, exactly as you would check your phone. But because you don't have to look down and dig around in your pocket, you could argue that there's _less_ distraction. By being so hands-free, it should be incredibly handy.

Even so, Google Glass might have a tough slog ahead for social acceptance. Not just because of the price ($1,500 to developers, perhaps $750 when it becomes publicly available in 2014). Not just because it's another gadget you have to charge every night.

No, the biggest obstacle is the smugness of people who wear Glass—and the deep discomfort of everyone who doesn't.

For a year now Google employees and celebrities have been allowed to wear Glass. But when I ran into a Google employee wearing it in public and had a conversation with her, the interaction was screamingly uncomfortable.

There she was, wearing this creepy-looking, faux-futuristic forehead band—with a built-in video camera pointed at my face. For all I knew, it _was_ recording me. (A little “recording” light is supposed to come on when Glass is recording. But this Googler was wearing an engineering sample, not the finished product. Besides, it'll probably take about a day for someone to come up with a recording app that doesn't activate the light.)

This puts Glass wearers in a position of control. They can take pictures and videos, post things online and even possibly use face-recognition apps to identify strangers in a crowd.

Months before Glass's public launch, one Seattle bar has already banned them. The patrons “definitely don't want to be secretly filmed or videotaped and immediately put on the Internet,” the bar's owner told a local radio station.

Maybe you like being on camera, maybe you don't. But either way, the assumption nowadays is that you _know_ you're on camera. With Google Glass, nobody's pointing a camera, camcorder or phone. You no longer know if you're being filmed by your conversation partner. An unspoken social rule is being violated. I didn't like it. I wanted her to take the damn thing off.

All these factors explain why Internet wags have already come up with a nickname for people who wear these special glasses: Glassholes. If Google's not careful, Glass will go the way of the Segway. It will be another stunning technology achievement, ultimately doomed to nichehood by the pure awkwardness, the attention-grubbing self-centeredness, of using it in public.

SCIENTIFIC AMERICAN ONLINE
Rules for wearing Glass with class: ScientificAmerican.com/jun2013/pogue

This article was originally published with the title "Google's Creep Factor" in Scientific American 308, 6, 38 (June 2013)

doi:10.1038/scientificamerican0613-38

ABOUT THE AUTHOR(S)

DAVID POGUE is the personal-technology columnist for the _New York Times_ and an Emmy Award–winning correspondent for _CBS News_.

question: Summarize the concerns people have about Google Glass.

answer: The biggest concern is distraction. People are worried that people will be reading texts and watching movies while they drive and scanning their e-mails during face-to-face conversation. Another concern is the price of the product. The biggest obstacle is the smugness of people who wear Glass and the discomfort of everyone who doesn't.

text: Omit the term "biggest" in the final sentence as it creates an incorrect context.

category: accuracy

question: What does the article say about the obstacles that might prevent Google Glass from gaining social acceptance?

answer: The biggest obstacle is the smugness of people who wear Glass, and the deep discomfort of everyone who doesn't. Google Glass wearers can take pictures and videos, post things online, and possibly use face-recognition apps to identify strangers in a crowd. One Seattle bar has already banned them.

critique: The response contains extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The answer should mention the price of Google Glass.

critique: The answer should mention the price of the glasses.

question: What does the article say about the development process for Google Glass?

answer: No answer

critique: The article mostly covers the public reception to Google Glass, so the development process is not covered in great detail.

critique: The article does not answer this question.

critique: The answer should mention that the article doesn't really talk about the development process.

critique: The article does not mention anything about the development process for Google Glass.


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THE 10TH ANNIVERSARY CELEBRATION OF AMERICAN MUSLIM 360!

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We're grateful for all who have become friends of American Muslim 360® Radio. It's easy with a $9.99 monthly tax deductible gift, just 33 cents a day...an amount based on each of us doing our small part to help keep us the place where your intellect is respected and your voice protected. We look for your help also during our national radio telethons when we have fun on air raising funds for a great cause. Our next Telethon is Ramadan 2020! But you can give anytime. Just CLICK ON THE BLUE DONATE BUTTON to make a one-time or recurring gift that you can cancel anytime. Stay tuned to the #1 Islamic radio station in the nation AM360.ORG because together we can remake the world! P.S. We're an Amazon partner too. CLICK HERE or on the logo below if shoppng at Amazon and CWSC will get a donation from Amazon Smile!

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We connect you with opportunities to serve and benefit society. We're a national resource center helping institutions nationwide increase their capacity to do good. We have the ability to leverage intellectual resources and distribute talent across geographical and institutional boundaries, and across the landscape of challenges and opportunities—that’s what a national intelligentsia can do for us and for the world. To unleash and harness the full capacity inherent in the group intellect, we'll have to make the connections not only inside Scripture, but also with one another…that’s the vision of CWSC!

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CWSC is a faith-based national conference bringing together diverse human resources, knowledge and experience to achieve the highest level of excellence in community life. We're strategically driven to excel in the best design and implementation of a national intelligentsia to serve communities nationwide and even to the global level! Tune in AM360.org, then join the work to help unleash and harness the full capacity inherent in our group intellect. CWSC does not discriminate on the basis of color, race, religion, ethnic or national origin in its community outreach. To explore leadership, community service and volunteer opportunities, email info@cwsc.us or call (910) 317-0297...Together we can remake the world.

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More than ever, individuals, families and communities are looking for real and sustainable solutions to issues that may appear insurmountable. We believe however that viable solutions abound with a sufficiently diverse and talented group intellect committed to true problem solving and opportunities realization. CWSC provides powerful answers via strategic initiatives in collaboration with other intrafaith and interfaith partners.

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question: What does the text say about how to stay safe during COVID 19?

answer: No answer

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critique: To comply with the instruction, add a response to the instruction.

question: What does the text say about American Muslim 306 Radio?

answer: American Muslim 360 Radio is the #1 Islamic radio station in the nation. It's a place where your intellect is respected and your voice protected. The radio station is celebrating its 10th anniversary.

critique: The radio station is celebrating its 10th anniversary by having a telethon.

critique: The response could be more detailed and discussed how it is the #1 Islamic Radio.

critique: The answer should mention that listeners can donate to the radio station.

critique: The answer does not mention that listeners can donate to the radio station.

critique: The radio station is celebrating its 10th anniversary.

critique: The answer omits the radio station's call sign.

critique: The answer should mention that the radio station asks for donations.

question: What does the text say about CWSC?

answer: CWSC is a faith-based national conference bringing together diverse human resources, knowledge, and experience to achieve the highest level of excellence in community life. CWSC is a national resource center helping institutions nationwide increase their capacity to do good. CWSC is teaming up with NPFF to provide key concepts in money and financial management for strategic wealth building.

critique: "international initiatives through partners who have a track record in international aid, humanitarian relief, infrastructure development, community support services, trade, and cultural exchange programs promoting global civic education and engagement" is not relevant to the CWSC

critique: The answer should mention the group intellect.

critique: The response is missing the part about CWSC's international initiatives.

critique: The first sentence is irrelevant to the question.

critique: The answer omits the CWSC's international initiatives.

question: What does the text say about the goals of AM360 and CWSC?

answer: The goals of AM360 and CWSC are to help people connect with opportunities to serve and benefit society. They are a national resource center helping institutions nationwide increase their capacity to do good. They have the ability to leverage intellectual resources and distribute talent across geographical and institutional boundaries, and across the landscape of challenges and opportunities. They are also a faith-based national conference bringing together diverse human resources, knowledge, and experience to achieve the highest level of excellence in community life. They are strategically driven to excel in the best design and implementation of a national intelligentsia to serve communities nationwide and even to the global level.

critique: It is omitted that they want to unleash and harness the full capacity inherent in the group intellect.

critique: The answer should mention the work to build a better place for ourselves.

critique: The answer could be more specific. It should mention the goals of AM360 specifically.

critique: The answer should mention the goals of the 10th Anniversary Celebration.

critique: The answer should mention that they are a non-profit.

critique: The answer should mention that they are a non-profit organization.

critique: The answer should mention the goals of AM360 and CWSC.


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LUTHERAN SOUTH ACADEMY is a private pre-kindergarten through 12th grade Christian school affiliated with the Lutheran Church–Missouri Synod located in Houston, Texas, United States. It is a member of the Houston Area Independent Schools, a group of roughly 50 private, parochial and independent institutions in the Greater Houston area.

History

In 1949, the Lutheran Education Association of Houston (LEAH) opened its first campus, Lutheran High School, at 6901 Woodridge in Houston, Texas. In 1982, as the Houston area continued to grow, Lutheran High School was closed and split into two campuses administered by LEAH. One of the schools, Lutheran High School North, was opened on 1 October 1980 at 1130 W. 34th Street on the north side of the city. The other campus, Lutheran High School South, was opened at 7703 South Loop East, near the intersection of the 610 Loop and I-45. As the need for land grew in order to continue expansion, the decision was made for the school to relocate. In 1998, the Lutheran High School South campus was moved to 12555 Ryewater Drive on the south side of Houston. As expansion of the new campus continued, the school's name was changed to Lutheran South Academy with the addition of Lower and Middle school facilities.[1]

On March 5, 2012, Lutheran South Academy was awarded “Exemplary School” status by Christian Williams and National Lutheran Schools Accreditation Commission, one of seven Lutheran schools to receive the award in the United States, and the first in Texas.[2]

Campus

The Lutheran South Academy campus consists of five main buildings.

-   Building “A” houses the high school (grades 9-12).
-   Building “B” includes the cafeteria, gymnasium, athletic office and administrative offices.
-   Building “C” houses the lower school (grades PreK-5).
-   Building “D”, the newest building on campus, houses the middle school (grades 6-8). Construction began on the building in 2007 and it was opened for the 2009-2010 school year.

Athletics

High school

-   Baseball (boys)
-   Basketball (boys and girls)
-   Cheer (girls)
-   Cross country (boys and girls)
-   Football (boys)
-   Soccer (boys and girls)
-   Softball (girls)
-   Swimming (boys and girls)
-   Tennis (boys and girls)
-   Track and field (boys and girls)
-   Volleyball (girls)

Middle school

-   Baseball (boys)
-   Basketball (boys and girls)
-   Cheer (girls)
-   Cross country (boys and girls)
-   Football (boys)
-   Soccer
-   Softball (girls)
-   Track and field (boys and girls)
-   Volleyball (girls)
-   Tennis (boys and girls)
-   Swimming (boys and girls)
-   Golf (boys and girls)

School uniforms

Students are required to wear school uniforms.[3]

[1] “History/Structure.” _Lutheran South Academy_. Retrieved on November 16, 2008.

[2] “1”.Retrieved October 24, 2012.

[3] “Uniforms.” _Lutheran South Academy_. Retrieved on November 16, 2008.

title: Lutheran South Academy

question: Summarize the history and function of the Lutheran South Academy.

answer: The Lutheran South Academy is a private pre-kindergarten through 12th grade Christian school affiliated with the Lutheran Church-Missouri Synod located in Houston, Texas, United States. It is a member of the Houston Area Independent Schools, a group of roughly 50 private, parochial, and independent institutions in the Greater Houston area. The school was opened in 1949 as the Lutheran Education Association of Houston (LEAH) opened its first campus, Lutheran High School, at 6901 Woodridge in Houston, Texas. In 1982, as the Houston area continued to grow, Lutheran High School was closed and split into two campuses administered by LEAH. One of the schools, Lutheran High School North, was opened on 1 October 1980 at 1130 W. 34th Street on the north side of the city. The other campus, Lutheran High School South, was opened at 7703 South Loop East, near the intersection of the 610 Loop and I-45. As the need for land grew in order to continue expansion, the decision was made for the school to relocate. In 1998, the Lutheran High School South campus was moved to 12555 Ryewater Drive on the south side of Houston. As expansion of the new campus continued, the school's name was changed to Lutheran South Academy with the addition of Lower and Middle school facilities.

critique: It's specifically the pre-kindergarten through 12th grade, and not preschool.

critique: The answer is a copy-and-paste of the article.

critique: The school was not opened in 1949. It was opened in 1982.

critique: The answer is a summary of the article, not a summary of the school's history.

critique: This is not a summary of the history and function of the Lutheran South Academy.

critique: The first sentence is unnecessary and the sentence is too long.

critique: The answer is a summary of the article, not a summary of the school.

critique: The answer is a copy and paste of the article and should be rewritten.

question: What does the article say about biology education at the Lutheran South Academy?

answer: No answer

critique: The article doesn't mention biology education.

critique: While biology education per se isn't mentioned, there are sections entitled "Athletics" and "Uniforms".


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Sticks and Stones may break my bones, But these words will always kill me.

Time is short, they have found me and they will soon break through the wards on the doorways, I cannot tell you everything but I can give you enough to see the truth.

At the beginning of mankind, a dangerous world of monsters threatened its very existence. The life of each individual balanced delicately on a knife edge and nobody was safe no matter how they tried to hide or defend themselves. That was the way of things, until one day a break through was made, Enuncia.

A weapon that not only saved mankind from extinction, but was instrumental in their eventual mastery of the world. Words of power that when heard could trick, maim and even kill. A perfect, versatile weapon not limited to the physical ability of the user. These words took two forms, those of creation and those of destruction.

The first people debated in what circumstances such words should be used in and which words were too powerful, which words were too cruel, which words were good and evil. A disagreement took place, the first people split into two tribes. These tribes were named after the form of Enuncia they used, good and evil.

I cannot tell you these words or un-words rather, pronunciation is very particular a slight lapse in a phrase commonly results in a lack of effect or on the rare occasion it may cause harm to you and the world around you. I've seen people burst like a ripe grape, sectioned into geometric pieces and far worse. In fact many of the "spontaneous combustions" reported are in fact people making mistakes in Enuncia or accidentally forming these un-words of power without the proper training to survive speaking them.

The evil were not satisfied, they began a war with the good. A war that killed thousands, burst reality like a spent shell casing and left in its place scars in the skin of the universe. A war that lasted millennia, a war that may yet begin again.

One such scar in reality was created during a battle at sea between Sartan of the Evil and Gabreel of the good, a conflict of such magnitude that warped interpretations of these two mighty people appear in religious texts even now. Sartan horribly wounded, in desperation combined un-words into one final attack, causing an explosion that killed them both and left a wound so large in the fabric of reality that it still swallows people, ships and planes. I believe they call this place the Bermuda triangle now.

I digress, in the end both tribes threw all they had into one final effort, destroying each other until all that remained was a few deserters from each side avoiding each other in mutual fear. Thus the knowledge of Enuncia degraded over time, the words became corrupted through the changing of accents and the improper transference of knowledge to their descendants.

Few remembered the old weapon, even fewer were willing to use it, those using it were seen as gods, daemons and sorcerers. Some were worshipped, some hunted down and killed. I will not recite their stories here as a great many became myths or legends that are well known even now. Witches and wizards, great heroes, world leaders. Hitler was one such descendant of the evil tribe, you never wondered how his speeches were so influential on people, driving them to do terrible things? You never thought it strange that prayer, trying to bring salvation through the spoken word, is such a core part of most religions? So naïve.

Then again, much of the truth in these tales have been lost over the years, lost or covered over. Adam and eve were tricked by a snake, this is partially true as a descendant of the evil tribe had his tongue surgically altered to be forked in order to better pronounce some of the words of destruction as the purer the pronunciation the more effective the un-word becomes. Notice how the words good and evil are so similar to God and Devil? It is no coincidence.

Do you wonder why we have curse words? There are words that can curse you or others but you're too far from proper pronunciation to use them.

If you ever inexplicably bleed from the mouth but have good dental hygiene you may even have said a lesser un-word by accident without ever realizing. So many of those words are lost to us now, but they are making progress in recovering them, they listen to your conversations through the microphone on your phone and laptop, in the hopes that if you are killed through an accidental enunciation they will have recorded the word. As the saying goes enough monkeys at type writers would eventually produce the combined works of Shakespeare. So enough people spontaneously combust and the beautiful language of Enuncia will live again and bring humanity into new heights of success or new depths in depravity. Those who crave this are known only as the whisper men.

It's too late for me, the whisper men will soon break down the warded door. The whispers have turned to shouts, the shouts have turned to roars and the roars have turned to concussive booms. There is no time left, there is one thing they do not know, we of the good left clues for you in some of the most famous literally works. I can't say more than that, just be careful for if you but whisper the right words you can still stop them.

Remember, sticks and stones may break your bones but words will always be the key.

title: [HF] [FN] Sticks and stones may break my bones, But words will always kill me

question: What does the story say about angels?

answer: No answer

critique: The story does not mention angels explicitly. However, Gabreel is mentioned. Despite being called 'a mighty person', it could be assumed that he is an angel.

question: What does the story say about Enuncia?

answer: Enuncia is a weapon that was instrumental in mankind's eventual mastery of the world. It is a weapon that not only saved mankind from extinction, but was also a versatile weapon that was not limited to the physical ability of the user. These words took two forms, those of creation and those of destruction. The first people debated in what circumstances such words should be used in and which words were too powerful, which words were too cruel, which words were good and evil. A disagreement took place, the first people split into two tribes. These tribes were named after the form of Enuncia they used, good and evil. The evil were not satisfied, they began a war with the good. A war that lasted millennia, a war that may yet begin again.

critique: The answer should mention the Bermuda Triangle.

critique: The answer is too long. The last paragraph should be removed.

critique: This answer fails to address the question, and instead gives a summary of the entirety of the story. The items uncovered by the question should be clear to give an answer as it seems.

critique: The answer should mention the Bermuda triangle.

question: Why do people spontaneously combust or burst like ripe grapes?

answer: They make mistakes while using or pronouncing Enuncia.

critique: It is not necessary to use "or" in the answer.

critique: The answer should mention that the spontaneous combustion is caused by the misuse of un-words.

critique: "They make mistakes while using or pronouncing Enuncia." - this is incorrect. The narrator said that people burst like ripe grapes because of a lapse in a phrase commonly results in a lack of effect or on the rare occasion it may cause harm to you and the world around you.

critique: The answer should mention that the spontaneous combustion is caused by the misuse of the words of power.

critique: More than one mistake results in spontaneous combust

critique: The answer could be phrased as a complete sentence.

critique: The response could be clearer in its pronoun use.

question: Summarize the main conflict in the story.

answer: The main conflict in the story is the war between the good and evil tribes. The good tribe used Enuncia, a weapon of words, to fight the evil tribe. The war lasted for millennia and destroyed much of the world. The good tribe eventually won the war, but the knowledge of Enuncia degraded over time. The evil tribe was almost completely wiped out, but some of them survived and hid from the good tribe.

critique: The answer should mention the Whisper Men.

critique: The response is missing the part about the evil tribe starting the war.

critique: The answer is a bit inaccurate. The good tribe did not win the war.

critique: The last sentence is not relevant to the main conflict.

critique: This should mention why the evil tribe still exists.

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     It wouldn’t last for forever. Everyone had the thought in the back of their minds at one point or another. The gods of pop music had fallen. N’Sync, The Backstreet Boys, and Destiny’s Child all had their moment in the spotlight, but that moment had passed. The executives of the music industry knew this. They also that music of the present was paling in comparison to music of the past. Justin Timberlake is a dancing monkey compared to Bob Dylan. TATU became small when Simon and Garfunkel were mentioned. They needed to solve this problem, so they came together to create a plan to continue to milk the cash cow. This plan that they eventually came up with was called Project Tween.

     Project Tween was kept secret amongst the group. It was truthfully brilliant, and all they needed was a lot of money and some scientific help, which can easily be bought. The idea was to create millions of highly advanced androids that could take the place of girls between the ages of 10-13 throughout the country. These machines would be indistinguishable from the girls. The main goal of the tweens is to boost the sales of all of the people involved in their creation. The creators have also created a name for their organization; The Illuminati. Originally the Illuminati consisted of only music agents who wanted to save their careers and make it big but over the years, members outside of the music realm had been added to the secret society.

     The mission of the tweens is to infiltrate the homes of the parents of their target. There, they will sprinkle the real girl with “pixie dust”, a military grade sleeping agent that will allow them to sleep for 3 or 4 years and feel like it’s only been a night, and bring them back to headquarters. From here, they assume the identity of the girl. At this point, they’re programmed to be hooked on whatever music receives the most money, no matter what the quality.

     They will want everything that has to do with the artist they are programmed to support. They will buy posters, merchandise, concert tickets, and, most importantly, they will use social media, such as Facebook and Instagram, to spread photos and videos of the artist, and posts about how in love they are with him. This is an attempt to contribute to the author’s following and fan base. This will get him or her more endorsements, late-night appearances, and general fame. One of the scientific breakthroughs of the tweens is their fueling system. The tweens literally need Starbucks coffee to survive. The CEO of Starbucks is one of the main funders of the Illuminati, and he wanted to make sure that he got the most bang for his buck. They will also treat the beverages like they are pop stars, and blog, tweet, and post about them.

    So here we are in the year 2014. This system has carried on seamlessly since its inception in the mid-2000’s, and originality has begun to fade. Artists no longer have to try to create meaningful songs. Their loving fans exist to boost their lyrics to the heavens. Stars have also become worse role models. They’re aware that, no matter what, their fans will love them. They can get into bar fights, drag races, and drug circles with little to no consequence. If they’re caught, they won’t face jail, but will merely go to “rehab” and write a song about how they’re the victims. But these “artists” aren’t aware that the fans are robots. They think they’ve captivated the hearts of girls all across the country by being themselves. They think they deserve the fame, that they’ve earned the fame. Honestly, they’re just regular people who happened upon a stroke of luck. Anyone can lip sync an hour-long concert with a million mindless machines in the crowd, but only few can inspire with true music and meaning. Few can end wars or invoke social change with just a guitar and a message, and these people are rare to come by in the field of generic artists out there today.

title: Project Tween (Social Satire 691 words)

question: Summarize the second paragraph.

answer: The second paragraph describes Project Tween. Project Tween is a plan to create millions of highly advanced androids that could take the place of girls between the ages of 10-13 throughout the country. The main goal of the tweens is to boost the sales of all of the people involved in their creation.

critique: The second paragraph does not describe Project Tween. It describes the tweens.

critique: This answer omits the reason for the creation of Project Tween.

critique: This might be true in the story, but readers don't need to know that. It's self-explanatory.

critique: The answer should mention the Illuminati.

question: Summarize the timeline of Project Tween.

answer: The project was started in the mid-2000s.

critique: The project was started in the mid-2000s, but it has been running since then.

critique: The project was started in the mid-2000s, but it is still ongoing.

critique: It is omitted that the project was started to save the careers of music agents.

critique: The project was started in the mid-2000s, but the story is set in 2014.

critique: It's omitted that the project was kept secret amongst the group until 2014.

critique: The mission of the project should probably be mentioned.

question: What does the story say about indie rock?

answer: No answer

critique: The passage does not mention anything about indie rock.

critique: The answer should mention that the author of the story is critical of the music industry in general, but also of pop and mainstream music.

critique: There is no mention of indie rock in the passage.

critique: The question asks about indie rock, which is not mentioned in the story.

question: What does the story say about Starbucks?

answer: The CEO of Starbucks is one of the main funders of the Illuminati. He wants to make sure he gets the most bang for his buck. The tweens need Starbucks coffee to survive. They will also treat the beverages like they are pop stars, and blog, tweet, and post about them.

critique: The answer should mention that the CEO of Starbucks is also a main funder of Project Tween.

critique: The answer should mention that the CEO of Starbucks is also a robot.

critique: A few minor grammatical edits would enhance this response.

critique: The answer could be clearer about who the CEO of Starbucks is.

critique: The answer should mention that the CEO of Starbucks is also one of the main funders of Project Tween.

critique: The tweens treat coffee like it's a pop star. It's not the other way around.

question: Summarize the tenth paragraph.

answer: The author describes the negative effects of Project Tween, including the lack of originality in music and the lowered quality of role models.

critique: It is omitted that the work combines this with how the artist believes their fans are real and the marketers behind them influences their success.

critique: The answer should mention the lack of consequences for artists.

critique: The answer should mention the lack of consequences for bad behavior.

critique: The answer should include the effects on the music industry.

critique: The author also describes how the music industry has affected the quality of music.

critique: The answer should mention the author's opinion about the artists.

critique: The answer omits the negative effects of Project Tween on the music industry.

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NAMRI SONGTSEN (),[1] also known as “Namri Löntsen” () (570?–618?/629) was, according to tradition, the 32nd King of Tibet of the Yarlung Dynasty, which until his reign ruled only the Yarlung Valley. He expanded his kingdom to rule the central part of the Tibetan Plateau. His actions were decisive in the setting up of the Tibetan Empire (7th century), to which he can be named co-founder with his son, Songtsen Gampo.

Context

Namri Songtsen was a member of the Yarlung tribe, located to the southeast of Lhasa, in the fertile Yarlung Valley[2] where the Tsangpo (known in India as the Brahmaputra) supported both agriculture and human life. The Tibetan plateau was, at this time, a mosaic of clans of mountain shepherds with simple nomadic organizations[3] where intertribal fighting and razzia sorties are part of the local economy.[4] Each clan had several chiefs. These clans had few material and cultural exchanges according to topography, climate, and distances, which means that each clan, located in a specified network of valleys, had its own culture with little in common with other clans.[5] These “proto-Tibetans” were isolated from relations with the outside world, though some mountain groups to the east in Sichuan, Qinghai and the 'Azha kingdom dwelt in border areas contiguous with, or within, the Chinese empire.[6] Early Chinese sources appear to mention proto-Tibetan peoples in a few rare cases, if the Qiang and Rong do indeed refer to them.[7] This changed dramatically by the beginning of Tang Dynasty, the Tibetan kingdom becoming a powerful player in the military history of Eastern and Central Asia.

Several Tibetan historical accounts say that it was in Namri Songtsen's time that Tibetans obtained their first knowledge of astrology and medicine from China.[8] Others associate the introduction of these sciences with his son.[9] In the period, knowledge of these and other sciences came from a variety of countries, not only from China,[10] but also from Buddhist India, Byzantium,[11][12] and Central Asia.[13]

Upbringing and life

Around 600, Namri Songtsen, one of the several Yarlung tribal chieftains, become the uncontested leader of the several Yarlung clans. Using shepherd-warriors he subdued the neighbouring tribes one after another. Expanding his rule to all of modern Central Tibet, including the Lhasa region[14] allowed him to rule over many groups, and to begin the establishment of a centralized and strong state, with skilled troops who gained experience in their many battles in the early 7th century. This formed an important base for the later conquests by his son, which unified the whole of the Tibetan plateau.[15] According to Beckwith, Namri Songtsen sent the first diplomatic missions to open relations with China, in 608 and 609.[16]

Assassination and succession

Namri Songtsen was assassinated by poisoning in 618 or 629/630, by a coup d'état which eventually failed, being crushed by Namri Songtsen's son, who developed his heritage, completing the submission of the Tibetan plateau, and, according to later histories, introduced a unified legal code, a Tibetan writing system, an archive for official records, an army, and relations with the outside world.

[1] Stein (1972), p. 298.

[2] Kolmaš, 1967, p.5

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[4] Robert Brainerd Ekvall, _Fields on the hoof: nexus of Tibetan nomadic pastoralism,_Waveland Press, 1983 pp. 52-3.

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[6] Kolmaš, 1967, p.?

[7] Kolmaš, 1967, p.2 : The 羌 (Qiang) and 戎 (Rong) appear on oracle bones as early as the 13th and 12th century BC.

[8] Bsod-nams-rgyal-mtshan (Sa-skya-pa Bla-ma Dam-pa),_The clear mirror_: a traditional account of Tibet's golden age, tr. McComas Taylor and Lama Choedak Yuthok, Snow Lion Publications, 1996 p.90.

[9] Rolf Alfred Stein, _Tibetan Civilization,_ Stanford University Press, 1972 p. 51.

[10] Jean-Claude Martzloff, _A history of chinese mathematics,_ Springer 206 p.110.

[11] Dan Martin, 'Greek and Islamic Medicines' Historical Contact with Tibet: A Reassessment in View of Recently Available but Relatively Early Sources on Tibetan Medical Eclecticism'' in Anna Akasoy, Charles Burnett, Ronit Yoeli-Tlalim (eds.)_Islam and Tibet: Interactions Along the Musk Routes,_ Ashgate 2011,pp.117-144, p. 128.

[12] Christopher I. Beckwith, 'The Introduction of Greek Medicine into Tibet in the Seventh and Eighth Centuries,' in _Journal of the American Oriental Society,_ 99:2 (1979) pp. 297-313.

[13] Henk Blezer et al., 'Brief Outlook:Desiderata in the Study of the History of Tibetan Medicine,' in Mona Schrempf (ed.) _Soundings in Tibetan medicine: anthropological and historical perspectives,_ Brill, 207 pp. 427-437, p. 430 n.5.

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[16] Beckwith, C. Uni. de l'Indiana Diss. 1977

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_WITHOUT A TRACE_ is a 1983 American drama film directed by Stanley R. Jaffe and starring Kate Nelligan, Judd Hirsch, David Dukes and Stockard Channing. It is based on the novel _Still Missing_ by Beth Gutcheon. The story is partly based on the disappearance of Etan Patz.

Plot

Susan Selky is a well-known English professor at Columbia University. She lives in a Brooklyn brownstone with her 6-year-old son Alex (Danny Corkill). One March morning, Susan sees Alex off to school, which is only two blocks away. Alex turns to wave to his mother, then disappears around the corner.

Susan returns home after work, and becomes increasingly alarmed when Alex is late. She calls her friend and neighbor Jocelyn Norris, whose daughter is a classmate of Alex's, and learns Alex never went to school. She immediately calls the New York City Police Department, and officers descend on the townhouse, led by Lieutenant Al Menetti. Susan is questioned closely on all aspects of her life and her son's, and the police initially suspect her estranged husband, Graham, a professor at New York University, but he produces an alibi.

Susan's case generates attention from the local media, and citizens help in the search by distributing posters. Susan is initially criticized for allowing her son to walk to school by himself. Susan takes a polygraph test that clears her as a suspect. Numerous leads are checked out, including several reports that Alex may have been seen in the back seat of a blue 1965 Chevy. A psychic is also called in, but each lead fizzles.

The investigation drags on, and Graham is at odds with Menetti after budget cuts force Menetti to dismantle the command center in Susan's apartment and run the case from the precinct. Menetti's attention is soon diverted to other cases, but the Selky case is always a priority. At one point, Graham takes matters into his own hands after he receives a ransom call. Given a beating, he requires a hospital stay.

A break in the case finally happens on the Fourth of July, when Susan's housecleaner, Philippe, is arrested as a suspect. A pair of Alex's bloody underpants was found in his apartment, where the gay Philippe was picked up with a 14-year-old male prostitute. Susan visits Philippe in jail, and he tells her that the bloody underpants came about when he used them to stop bleeding after he cut himself washing dishes in Susan's house. Convinced Philippe is innocent, Susan tries to persuade Menetti to drop the charges, but he refuses, citing undisclosed physical evidence.

The renewed media coverage generated by Philippe's arrest dies down, and Susan faces increased pressure to drop the matter and accept that Alex could be dead. Susan's feelings come to a boiling point when a magazine cancels an article she wrote about Alex, and Jocelyn advises her to give up. Susan tries to resume her normal routine, although she never loses faith. One day, she receives a phone call from a woman in Bridgeport, Connecticut, named Malvina Robbins, who says Alex is living with neighbors. Menetti tells Susan he has also heard from Robbins, but Bridgeport police told him the woman is a crank. The investigation is closed, he says, and Philippe goes on trial within weeks.

On a day off, Menetti takes a drive with his son. When he sees a sign for Bridgeport, Connecticut, he checks out the lead personally. He recruits his young son as his partner on the case. Once he is sure that the lead is false, Menetti hopes to browbeat Robbins from disturbing Selky. When Menetti arrives at Robbins' address, he is shocked to see a blue Chevy (in which witnesses had reported seeing Alex) parked in the driveway of the neighboring house. Realizing that Robbins was telling the truth, he uses her phone to contact the Bridgeport police. They find Alex alive and unharmed. His kidnapper wanted the boy to care for his disabled sister who lives in the house.

Menetti drives Alex back to New York with a huge police escort (which grows with each jurisdiction it passes through), and the New York media is tipped off that he has been found, converging on Susan's Brooklyn house. Susan returns from grocery shopping in time to see Alex stepping out of Menetti's car. In front of delighted bystanders and reporters, mother and child are reunited.

Cast

-   Kate Nelligan as Susan Selky
-   Judd Hirsch as Al Menetti
-   David Dukes as Graham
-   Stockard Channing as Jocelyn Norris
-   Danny Corkill as Alex
-   Louise Stubbs as Malvina Robbins
-   Keith McDermott as Philippe
-   David Simon as Menetti's son

Production

The film's screenplay was written by novelist and screenwriter Beth Gutcheon, who kept the film relatively faithful to her novel _Still Missing_, a work of fiction. The one glaring difference between the book and the film is that the book was set in Boston, while the film was set and filmed in New York. The film was originally supposed to be titled _Still Missing_, but was changed by the studio to avoid confusion with the 1982 film _Missing_.

Release

The film was released in North America on February 4, 1983, and grossed $9.6 million.[1]

Reception

Janet Maslin of _The New York Times_ called it “a reasonably well-made film” on its own terms but said it “deserves more thoughtful and imaginative treatment”.[2]

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title: Without a Trace (1983 film)

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_The Matcha Sundae and Matcha Sparklers, our favorites at Shuhari Matcha Cafe (Photo by Jean Trinh/LAist)_

A Japanese green tea-obsessed cafe with roots across the Pacific just landed in Venice—and they're making a splash with their sparkling matcha sodas and sliders drizzled with tart _ume_-mayo.

At first glance, the minimalist Shuhari Matcha Cafe looks very modern, with its sleek, white-tiled walls and muted, wooden accents. But once you dive into the tiny cafe on Abbot Kinney, you'll come to realize that the team behind it is trying to meld the old school with the new.

Their drink menu is a doozy, with over 40 green tea beverages, some of which have modern twists like matcha lattes laced with nutty _kinako_ powder and _kuromitsu_—a molasses-like syrup. And then there are all the bubbly matcha sparklers (which could very well become the _it_ drink of the summer) that are refreshing and heightened with flavors like freshly squeezed lemon juice, yuzu, pineapple and mint. Just like getting a drink at a bar, these sparklers are mixed together in cocktail shakers behind the counter. Trust us, get one.

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_The Matcha Sparkler gets mixed in a cocktail shaker. (Photo by Jean Trinh/LAist)_

If you're a purist, you can order green tea brewed the right way—and get to watch the meticulous process in action behind the counter that's decorated with rows of Japanese tea pots. Marc Chapman, Shuhari's manager, told LAist, "Each different tea is made properly, from the temperature to the steeping time to the water and what not."

If you couldn't tell already, these guys are serious about their green teas. Their jade-tinged tea leaves are sourced straight from the tea fields in Japan and curated by an expert who works with the tea farmers. If you want to expand your knowledge of green teas, they have a wall lined with bags of different varieties that you can buy and take home.

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_Green tea bags that you can buy to take home. (Photo by Jean Trinh/LAist)_

We were invited to check out Shuhari's grand opening on Thursday, and found glass cases full of Japanese grab-and-go pastries—like red-bean buns and curry bread—that hail from Cream Pan, a Japanese bakery in Tustin. The rest of the food comes from the mind of chef Michael Bower Johnston, who lived in Japan for 20 years and previously ran Wolfgang Puck's restaurants in the Land of the Rising Sun. He's a big supporter of making texture the star in his small bites, and it's evident in the dishes.

Take, for instance, his sundaes. The signature matcha sundae is a tornado of matcha ice cream swirled with red bean and _kuromitsu_ syrup, and then gorgeously topped with crunchy cornflakes, lightly sour dehydrated raspberries and dusted with matcha and _kinako_ powders. It's a balanced dessert that isn't overly sweet and chock full of texture, just like Johnston intended.

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_Spicy Californian onigiratsu. (Photo by Jean Trinh/LAist)_

Their grab-and-go _onigiratzu_ is an popular trend imported straight from Japan. This one is similar to the _onigiri_ rice balls, but instead of molding the rice balls by hand (which relates to the meaning of the word _onigiri_), the _onigiratzu_ is sandwiched between layers of seaweed and rice. The fillings for the _onigartzu_ are a "modern twist on the concept" and a "marriage of East-meets-West," Chapman said. Inside you'll find shredded chicken topped with a flavorful _umeboshi_-mayo, or a yuzu-pepper sauce. Other fillings consist of pork loin stewed in a ginger sauce, and a creamy, wasabi-tinged tuna salad paired with hearts of palm.

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_Creamy ume chicken slider (left) and creamy wasabi tuna heart of palm slider (right). (Photo by Jean Trinh/LAist)_

These fillings also make up some of Shuhari's sliders, which come out stuffed in the pillow-like, toasted bread rolls, and are paired with a crunchy slaw mixture of cabbage, shiso leaves and pickled shallots. You'll find other gourmet options like miso walnut pumpkin salad, and yuzu miso avocado on the menu. And if you're looking for something sweet, they'll even fill those rolls with house-made matcha butter or a strawberry balsamic glaze.

This is just the start for Shuhari Matcha Cafe. The company is planning on expanding their shops "hopefully to the rest of America and the world," Chapman said. Maybe they could be the next Starbucks?

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_Inside Shuhari Matcha Cafe (Photo by Jean Trinh/LAist)_

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_The back patio at Shuhari Matcha Cafe. (Photo by Jean Trinh/LAist)_

_Shuhari Matcha Cafe is located at 1522 Abbot Kinney Blvd., Venice, (424) 238-8324. Starting on July 9, the cafe will be open daily from 11 a.m. - 4 p.m., and beginning on July 18, the hours will expand to 7 a.m. - 8 p.m. Drinks and food range from $3.50 - $8.50._

_Jean Trinh is a freelance food and entertainment writer, whose work has appeared in VICE, LA Weekly, LA Magazine and The Daily Beast. Follow her on Instagram, Twitter and on her website._

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