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Lesbians, gay men and bisexual adults in California are more likely than straight people to delay seeking medical care, even though they have the same or even higher rates of health insurance coverage, according to a new study.

Researchers at UCLA examined survey data from about 83,000 California adults that included questions on a variety of health indicators, including access to health care and insurance, health problems, health behaviors and sexual orientation. They found that gay and bisexual men were more likely than straight men to have health insurance, while lesbian and bisexual women had similar rates of health insurance coverage compared to straight women.

But when it came to actually using their health insurance coverage, gay, lesbian and bisexual adults lagged significantly behind their straight peers. Twenty percent of gay men and 21 percent of bisexual men reported delaying seeking health care in the past year, compared to 13 percent of straight men.

Among gay and bisexual women the difference was even more pronounced. While just 18 percent of straight women reported delaying care, almost 30 percent of lesbians and bisexual women said they’d put off seeing a doctor.

“Unfortunately we don’t have the data to answer (why) directly,” said Susan Babey, one of the authors of the report. “But other research suggests that one possibility is that lesbian, gay and bisexual adults have experienced discrimination or not feeling welcome in health care settings in the past and so are avoiding repeating those kinds of experiences by delaying care even if they need to see a medical provider.”

That conclusion sounded right to Amanda Wallner, director of the California LGBT Health and Human Services Network, a statewide coalition of non-profit providers, community centers, and researchers advocating for policies and resources to advance LGBT health.

“It’s something that we’ve actually known about for a while. Other studies have shown similar findings and anecdotally we hear stories about this all the time,” she said. “It’s an entirely rational reaction…[LGBT adults] are responding to either their own previous experiences of discrimination or to a perception that they may experience that.”

Wallner said she’s heard stories of doctors refusing to provide certain medical treatment to LGBT people, questioning their lifestyle behaviors and not respecting their relationships. Another problem is transportation, she said. Some people only want to go to clinics they know are friendly to the LGBT community. But getting to those clinics can be a challenge, she said, because there often aren’t many of them and they may be far from where patients live.

When people don’t seek medical care early it can be costly to both patients and society, said Babey. Those who delay seeing a doctor can end up with more serious and difficult-to-treat health conditions, and are more likely to need emergency care, she said. In fact, the UCLA study shows gay, lesbian and bisexual adults visited the emergency department more often than straight adults. The difference was especially pronounced for bisexuals.

The study didn’t examine health access for transgender and questioning people. That was due to a lack of survey data on that population, Babey said. However, the researchers plan to look into the issue in a future study, she said.

Wallner said health providers can help address LGBT patients’ distrust of the medical system by taking steps to be more affirming toward them. Practices should include using patients’ preferred names and pronouns, asking LGBT people about their relationships but not focusing on sexual orientation to the exclusion of other aspects of their lives, conducting training on LGBTQ awareness and cultural competency, partnering with local LGBTQ organizations to do outreach, and showing posters in their health care practices that include LGBT people and families, she said.

“I look forward to the day when we start to chip away at those disparities and people do feel comfortable going into their doctor,” Wallner said. “We need to break down the stigma because it’s killing people.”

question: What does the article say about the death rate among the LGBT in California?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should include that while there is no direct correlation between the death rates and the rates of health care use, doctors should be aware that  people in the LGBT community tend to seek medical care after it is too late, at a point when their condition is more serious.

critique: The response misses to mention that the article does not mention anything about the death rate among the LGBT in California.

critique: It is omitted that the death rate among the LGBT in California is not discussed in the article.

question: Summarize the reasons for LGBT members to avoid healthcare.

answer: According to the article, LGBT members avoid healthcare for a variety of reasons. Some of these include discrimination and lack of trust in the medical system. A doctor may refuse to provide certain medical treatment to LGBT people, question their lifestyle behaviors, or not respect their relationships. Transportation can be another issue, as some people don't want to go to clinics they know are friendly to the LGBT community.

critique: The answer should mention the UCLA study.

critique: The answer omits the fact that the discrimination is due to the fact that some healthcare providers are not welcoming to LGBT members.

critique: It is omitted that some clinics are far from where patients live.

critique: The article does not mention transportation as a reason for LGBT members to avoid healthcare.

critique: The answer should mention the emergency department.

critique: The answer omits a few other reasons mentioned in the article, such as fearing that they may experience discrimination.

critique: It's omitted that there are few clinics.

text: "some people don't want to go to clinics they know are friendly to the LGBT community." - this is incorrect. "friendly" should be replaced with "not friendly"


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Chat Transcript 09/17/2012
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G: Hey there!

R: Hi, What's up?

G: Marry me?

R: nope

G: :-(

R: Are you gonna do that every time we talk?

G: of course!

R: ha

R: you're funny

G: ...and cute

G: ...and a good cook

R: yes

G: and quite romantic

G: and a good dad

G: and sexy... did I forget sexy?

G: and I have a nice voice

R: Don't forget how modest you are

G: Oh!  I forgot that one!  I'm the most modest man on earth!

R: that's right!

G: I'm so humble that they tried to crown me king of humility

G: ...only...

G: I was too humble to accept

R: haha!

G: See! I make you laugh!

R: Quite a lot right now, actually :-)

G: Think about it... a life with me would be full of laughter and romance and good food!

R: Are you trying to romance me with this?

G: Hmm, I don't know... is it working?

R: ...

R: I'm starting to think you have a quota to fill.. that you must propose to me at least once every single day

R: you seem to be doing that

G: Well, if you ever say yes, imagine how romantic it would be to tell our children:

G: "He proposed to me every day for 2 years, until I finally said yes, on Sept 17th, 2012!"

R: lol, you wish!

G: *obviously!*

G: The kids will say, "why did you keep asking, Daddy?"

G: And I'll say, "Because, once you meet an angel, you'd be a fool to not do everything on your power to win her heart'

G: Then they'll say, "why did you say yes, mommy?"

R: and just what will I say, in this hypothetical future?

G: You'll say, "I said yes because he told us about this day, with my perfect children and my handsome, romantic husband.  And I knew that was the future I wanted, and now it's come true, more perfect than I could ever imagine."

G: And then I'll kiss you deeply

G: And our children will say "ewww"

G: And it will still be romantic as always

G: Then we'll tuck them in together, and go out to our porch with a glass of wine and watch the stars, wrapped in eachother's arms

R: aww

R: ok, that was seriously cute

G: :-)

R: We also have to put Nanny back in the dog house

R: and make sure the windows are closed.

R: Then it'll be a good night

G: Lol... of course

G: ...

G: Tell the truth, you liked that one even better than my sunset-horseback-picnic-proposal scenario from last week.

R: Oh come on, if I told you you'd never come out of the clouds

G: you have to tell!  For Science!

R: nope

R: A girl's gotta keep some secrets

G: Well, it seemed like a perfect future to me :-)

R: You'll just never know :-)

G: I don't know about that, maybe one day you'll say yes

G: and I'll get to live it :-)

R: Perhaps

R: Ask me again tomorrow ;-)

G: of course!

title: A Modest Proposal

question: What does the story say about the other reason for G and R's chat?

answer: No answer

critique: The response misses to mention that the other reason for G and R's chat is to propose to R.

question: What does the story say about G?

answer: G is a guy that is trying to win the heart of R. He showers R with compliments on the things he loves and tells her how good he would be as a father and husband. He is persistent and persistent and declare is love for her.

critique: The answer should mention that G is a romantic.

critique: The answer does not mention that G is also very romantic.

critique: The response could use better sentence structure.

critique: "G is a guy that is trying to win the heart of R. He showers R with compliments on the things he loves and tells her how good he would be as a father and husband." - G is not the one trying to win R's heart. He is just trying to convince her to marry him. He doesn't shower her with compliments. He is just a good husband and father.

critique: The answer should include the fact that G proposed to R every single day for 2 years until she finally said yes.

critique: The response is missing a few key details about G.

text: 'He is persistent and persistent and declare is love for her.' This doesn't make sense grammatically and should be corrected for clarity.

category: coherence

question: What does the story say about R?

answer: R is a woman who is being courted by G, a man who proposes to her everyday for two years until she finally says yes on September 17, 2012. R is a bit annoyed by G's persistence.

critique: It is omitted that R is a good friend of G.

critique: G only proposes to R everyday for two years.

critique: "R is a woman" - add that R is G's girlfriend.

critique: It's omitted that R thinks G is funny, cute, good-looking, modest and quite romantic.

critique: The answer should mention that R is amused by G's proposal.

text:
'...a man who proposes to her everyday for two years until she finally says yes on September 17, 2012.' The answer should state that G has proposed to R for the past two years, hoping she'd say yes.
-'everyday' should be written separately in this context.
-'R is a bit annoyed by G's persistence.' This cannot be attested.

category: other

category_text: Accuracy and coherence.


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An earthquake occurred in northern Afghanistan on 30 May 1998, at 06:22 UTC in the Takhar Province with a moment magnitude of 6.5 and a maximum Mercalli intensity of VII (_Very strong_). At the time, the Afghan Civil War was underway; the affected area was controlled by the United Islamic Front for the Salvation of Afghanistan (the “Northern Alliance”).[1]

Overview

This was the second large earthquake in the area in 1998 after another earthquake on February 4.[2] Between 4,000–4,500 people died in Takhar and Badakhshan provinces.[3][4][5] Nearly 7,000 families were affected and estimated 16,000 houses were destroyed or damaged.[6] Approximately 45,000 people became homeless.[7] More than 30 villages were destroyed and another 70 were severely damaged.[8] Several thousand animals were killed and crops and infrastructure were destroyed.[9]

Like many other poorer developing nations, Afghanistan was ill-equipped to face this kind of natural disaster.[10] The country had no forms of protection or hazard micronization.[11] Houses were mainly built of mud brick with shallow foundation.[12] The villages were built on unstable slopes.[13] Many villages were entirely buried due to the landslides.[14] Aftershocks continued for a month.[15] It was also felt at Mazar-e Sharif, Kabul, Andijan, Samarkand, Islamabad, Peshawar, Rawalpindi and Dushanbe.[16]

Relief efforts

Several problems appeared during the relief operation. The affected region was remote and lacked any modern telecommunication.[17] The local culture prohibited male physicians from examining or speaking to women.[18] There was no available accurate map of the affected region.[19] However this problem was solved as the pilots of the first Tajikistan helicopters served with the Soviet Armed Forces in the area during the Soviet–Afghan War and knew many of the villages.[20] Relief efforts were also delayed because of blocked roads, bad weather and political turmoil in the region.[21]

Relief effort by several agencies in Afghanistan was administered from neighboring Pakistan, as many organizations had learned from previous experience not to base too many assets in Kabul or in any other city in Afghanistan.[22] A sub-base for the relief efforts was established in Rostaq in the Takhar Province near the Afghanistan-Tajikistan border, which in spite of lacking airfields, had open spaces for helicopter operations and a road link to Tajikistan.[23] A worldwide appeal for helicopters was made to assist in the relief operations.[24]

The United Nations (UN) and several non-governmental organizations (NGOs) were involved in the relief efforts of the affected area.[25] A joint relief operation was mounted by the UN, the International Committee of the Red Cross (ICRC), the International Federation of Red Cross and Red Crescent Societies (IFRC) and a number of national and international NGOs.[26]

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title: May 1998 Afghanistan earthquake

question: Describe the May 1998 Afghanistan Earthquake.

answer: The quake occurred in northern Afghanistan in Takhar Province. It had a moment magnitude of 6.5 and a maximum Mercalli intensity of VII. That is, it was a very strong earthquake. An Afghan Civil War was underway with the gathering of the Northern Alliance at the time of the earthquake. The affected area was very remote and huge relief efforts had to be mounted by the several agencies.

critique: The answer should mention the casualties.

critique: The Northern Alliance was not at the time of the earthquake.

critique: It spawned from "Takhar Province with a moment magnitude of 6.5 and a maximum Mercalli intensity of VII" to "affected area was controlled by the United Islamic Front for the Salvation of Afghanistan" as it was no longer just a province at that point.

critique: Remove 'an Afghan Civil War was underway with the gathering of the Northern Alliance at the time of the earthquake. The affected area was very remote and huge relief efforts had to be mounted by the several agencies' from the response because it's not stated in the article.

critique: "The affected area was very remote and huge relief efforts had to be mounted by the several agencies." - this is redundant and can be deleted.

question: How many people were affected?

answer: 7,000 families and 16,000 houses where affected by this natural disaster.

critique: The answer omits the number of people who died and became homeless.

critique: The answer should mention the death toll.

critique: The answer should mention the number of people who died.

critique: The number of people affected is not given in the text.

critique: The answer would be better as a complete sentence.

question: What was the response to the Earthquake like?

answer: A joint relief operation was mounted by the UN, the International Committee of the Red Cross, the International Federation of Red Cross and Red Crescent Societies, and a number of national and international NGOs.

critique: The response misses to mention that the affected region was remote and lacked any modern telecommunication. The local culture prohibited male physicians from examining or speaking to women. There was no available accurate map of the affected region.

critique: The answer should mention the difficulties encountered during relief efforts.

critique: The answer does not mention the problems that the relief efforts faced.

critique: The answer should mention the problems encountered during the relief effort.

critique: The answer should mention the problems encountered.

critique: The response misses to mention the difficulties faced during the relief efforts.

question: When did relief efforts begin?

answer: No answer

critique: Doesn't explicitly say, but the passage mentions agencies in Afghanistan began relief efforts while they were also administered from neighboring Pakistan.


text:
 This article is more than 5 YEARS OLD

Scheme will give claimants 14 days to explain infringements before benefits are docked after MPs criticise system as overly punitive

[Iain Duncan Smith]

Iain Duncan Smith said a ‘yellow card’ system would be trialled next year. Photograph: Ray Tang/Rex Shutterstock

An early warning system for benefit claimants facing sanctions is to be trialled in response to claims that an excessively punitive and bureaucratic system is driving some claimants deeper into poverty.

The work and pensions secretary, Iain Duncan Smith, has announced that claimants will be given a “yellow card” 14 days before their benefits are reduced. The warning allows them time to give a good reason for failing to meet the commitments they must make in return for getting benefits. Under current rules, sanctions are applied immediately.

Duncan Smith said the approach would be introduced on a trial basis, a relatively small commitment, next year.

“During this time, claimants will have another opportunity to provide further evidence to explain their non-compliance,” he said in a letter to the work and pensions select committee.

“We will then review this information before deciding whether a sanction remains appropriate. We expect that this will strike the right balance between enforcing the claimant commitment and fairness.”

The move comes after years of criticism and mounting evidence that claimants are winning appeals against Department for Work and Pensions (DWP) decision-makers, making the system more cumbersome and expensive.

In 2014, the DWP released figures showing that 58% of people seeking to overturn sanctions were successful – up from 20% before 2010.

In March, the work and pensions committee called for an independent inquiry into how the sanctions operated, the second in a year, and Duncan Smith’s announcement on Thursday is a formal response to a select committee report rushed out before the general election in May. The report said the sanctions regime appeared to be “purely punitive”.

In a written statement to parliament, the DWP has also announced changes to the way jobseeker’s allowance sanction notifications are sent out and an extension of “at risk” groups to cover homeless people and those with mental health conditions. People in these groups have greater access to hardship payments and will be able to appeal a decision more quickly.

Explaining the proposed early warning system, the DWP said: “At present people are notified of a sanction and it is imposed immediately afterwards. In some cases, claimants go on to challenge the decision and the sanction may be overturned. We will trial arrangements whereby claimants are given a warning of our intention to sanction and a 14-day period to provide evidence of good reason before the decision to sanction is made.”

But the DWP refused to accept the work and pensions select committee’s call for a full independent review of the workings of the sanctions system.

The department also rejected a request to set out the number of people who have died whilse subject to a sanction, saying that to do so might breach the DWP’s duty of confidentiality by identifying individuals. It also rejected the idea of setting up a new independent complaints procedure in the event of a death, saying that there were already means by which such complaints could be handled.

The government in its response said ministers would not impose additional requirements to work extra hours on universal credit claimants who are in work, at least until the current pilot schemes had been evaluated.

Kirsty McHugh, chief executive of the Employment Related Services Association, said: “We welcome the recognition by the secretary of state that the sanctions system is in need of reform, but are concerned that the changes today don’t go far enough.

“For some jobseekers, receiving a sanction can act as a ‘wake-up’ call. However, for the majority, the sanction system is more likely to hinder the journey to employment. Jobseekers move into work quickest when they feel positive about work and thus sanctions should only be used as a last resort.”

question: Summarize main news event.

answer: The work and pensions secretary, Iain Duncan Smith, announced that claimants will be given a "yellow card" 14 days before their benefits are reduced. The warning allows them time to give a good reason for failing to meet the commitments they must make in return for getting benefits. Under current rules, sanctions are applied immediately.

critique: The answer should mention the trial period.

critique: The response should include that the new system will be a trial.

text: There are more details about the new sanction system than what is summarized in the response.

category: coverage

question: Summarize the views of the opposing sides.

answer: The work and pensions secretary's views are that the sanctions are punitive, fair, and are likely to encourage compliance. They are also likely to reduce the cost of the system overall. The work and pensions select committee views sanctions as punitive and unnecessary, especially if they result in freezing out the claimant from any access to the social welfare system.

critique: The work and pensions select committee's views are not mentioned.

critique: The work and pensions select committee's views are not explicitly stated.

critique: The views of the work and pensions select committee are not mentioned.

critique: The work and pensions select committee's views are not explicitly stated in the article.

question: Summarize the reasons for the trial system.

answer: The trial system is meant to give claimants a chance to explain their infringements before their benefits are docked. This is meant to strike a balance between enforcing the claimant commitment and fairness.

critique: The answer is missing the part about the trial system being a response to claims that the sanctions system is punitive and bureaucratic.

critique: The answer should mention the increase in successful appeals against sanctions.

critique: The answer should mention that the trial system is meant to reduce the number of successful appeals.

critique: The answer should mention the need for change.

critique: The second sentence can be more specific.

critique: The answer should mention the mounting evidence that claimants are winning appeals against Department for Work and Pensions (DWP) decision-makers.

question: What does the text say about Iain Duncan Smith's career?

answer: No answer

critique: The correct answer is "no answer, but this is false". The article describes his current duties.

critique: The answer should mention that Duncan Smith is the work and pensions secretary.

critique: The answer should mention that he is the work and pensions secretary.

critique: The response misses to mention that Duncan Smith is the work and pensions secretary.

critique: It is omitted that Duncan Smith is the work and pensions secretary.

critique: The article does mention Duncan Smith's career.


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"The strangest thing was, there was no radio. Nothing. Up and down the dial. Just static or silence for months." Said Mike as they slowed to a stop at a four way intersection. Steve sat on the passenger side of the old army cargo truck, jotting on a notepad. The diesel rumbled cantankerously as the the beast lumbered forward.

Annabelle was an two and a half ton U.S. Army M35 truck. Big and square and serious. Or had been. Annabelle had seen better days. Big patches of paint were gone and rust nibbled away where it hadn't plain eaten right through. She had bumps and dings and dents and gouges. Some things were missing. Some were replaced. Some were wedged and hammered on with a wing and a prayer. The passenger side window had a big crack running along the hood and up the side that was covered with duct tape, giving her the look of taped up glasses. She was old and mean and stubborn and beat, but all in all, she was a good girl.

Mike was a bit older, mid fourties maybe. Thin. He was a week or so overdue for a haircut, but not yet shaggy. He juggled the steering wheel and shifter between his good right hand, the stump of his left and his knee. Steve was much younger. A little bit plump. From an easier time. He was writing for a newspaper or something. Who cares. He was company.

"Driving truck was one of the things I could do with this." He held up and waved his left hand. It was roughly a triangle behind where his thumb and knuckles used to be. His amputation scars had healed a long time ago. "It was crushed when a building collapsed right after everything fell apart. I couldn't fight too well, so I did what I could getting stuff to the guys who were. You know they say that the whole thing started with a spelling error? Some guy somewhere made a mistake in a computer code. Started a market panic. Whole thing spread like wildfire. Before you know the whole world was blowing each other up" He hit the clutch and shifted. The original shifter was gone, along with the boot. It was a piece of pipe with a pipe cap on the end dissapearing through a square hole in the floor.

"Like I said, there was no radio. No talk, no music. Nothing. They had the army radios for important stuff, but those were few and far between, all for the higher ups. Once in a while you could scrounge up some AA's for one of those little plastic jobbies, but there was nothing to pick up on it. You had a lot of time to think. Sometimes you'd get antsy for something, anything. Some guys had mp3 players or old phones. You could charge those up at the big bases. Once it was gone it was gone though." The truck swayed on the uneven road. The shock absorbers were useless rotted out tubes now, she wobbled on just her springs.

Annabelle tipped alarmingly to the side as they rounded a corner, swaying back and forth until she settled back onto her haunches. "Then they got the government station. They got enough broadcast towers together to cover most places. Took a long time to get to the more remote places. Instructions, news, things like that, they broadcast important stuff during the day, less so at night. They taught first aid in the morning, news at noon. At dawn they taught school, just to keep things going. A bit of math, a bit of history. Sometimes on slow days they'd play a song or two."

A few moments of silence passed as Steve's pencil scratched on paper. "I don't carry munitions much anymore. Not like the old days when they'd load Annie down untill her tires almost scraped the wells. Food now mostly. Wheat, corn. I carried sheep once. Annie didn't care much for that."

They slowed to a stop. The chain link and razor wire of what had once been a prison stretched off in either direction. Mike rolled down the window and handed a sheaf of papers to the bored man in the corrugated steel guardpost. He didn't bother reading too thoroughly.

"Well kid, end of the line." He said as they rolled into the unloading area, taking a seat in a long line of Annabelles, Betsies and couple of Rachels.

Steve let himself out and said goodbye. Mike sat there, put on the parking brake, patted the scarred up old steering wheel, clicked on the cheap plastic radio taped on top of the dashboard, and listened to the music.

title: Static

question: What does the excerpt say about the monotony of the truck driving job?

answer: No answer

critique: The passage does in fact refer to the monotony of driving a truck.

critique: The response does not make sense and does not hold a clear answer to the question. A better response would be to discuss the portions of the story addressing boredom.

critique: There is no direct information about it.

critique: The answer cannot be found in the input.

critique: There is no monotony in the truck driving job.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The monotony of the truck driving job is discussed.


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Sticks and Stones may break my bones, But these words will always kill me.

Time is short, they have found me and they will soon break through the wards on the doorways, I cannot tell you everything but I can give you enough to see the truth.

At the beginning of mankind, a dangerous world of monsters threatened its very existence. The life of each individual balanced delicately on a knife edge and nobody was safe no matter how they tried to hide or defend themselves. That was the way of things, until one day a break through was made, Enuncia.

A weapon that not only saved mankind from extinction, but was instrumental in their eventual mastery of the world. Words of power that when heard could trick, maim and even kill. A perfect, versatile weapon not limited to the physical ability of the user. These words took two forms, those of creation and those of destruction.

The first people debated in what circumstances such words should be used in and which words were too powerful, which words were too cruel, which words were good and evil. A disagreement took place, the first people split into two tribes. These tribes were named after the form of Enuncia they used, good and evil.

I cannot tell you these words or un-words rather, pronunciation is very particular a slight lapse in a phrase commonly results in a lack of effect or on the rare occasion it may cause harm to you and the world around you. I've seen people burst like a ripe grape, sectioned into geometric pieces and far worse. In fact many of the "spontaneous combustions" reported are in fact people making mistakes in Enuncia or accidentally forming these un-words of power without the proper training to survive speaking them.

The evil were not satisfied, they began a war with the good. A war that killed thousands, burst reality like a spent shell casing and left in its place scars in the skin of the universe. A war that lasted millennia, a war that may yet begin again.

One such scar in reality was created during a battle at sea between Sartan of the Evil and Gabreel of the good, a conflict of such magnitude that warped interpretations of these two mighty people appear in religious texts even now. Sartan horribly wounded, in desperation combined un-words into one final attack, causing an explosion that killed them both and left a wound so large in the fabric of reality that it still swallows people, ships and planes. I believe they call this place the Bermuda triangle now.

I digress, in the end both tribes threw all they had into one final effort, destroying each other until all that remained was a few deserters from each side avoiding each other in mutual fear. Thus the knowledge of Enuncia degraded over time, the words became corrupted through the changing of accents and the improper transference of knowledge to their descendants.

Few remembered the old weapon, even fewer were willing to use it, those using it were seen as gods, daemons and sorcerers. Some were worshipped, some hunted down and killed. I will not recite their stories here as a great many became myths or legends that are well known even now. Witches and wizards, great heroes, world leaders. Hitler was one such descendant of the evil tribe, you never wondered how his speeches were so influential on people, driving them to do terrible things? You never thought it strange that prayer, trying to bring salvation through the spoken word, is such a core part of most religions? So naïve.

Then again, much of the truth in these tales have been lost over the years, lost or covered over. Adam and eve were tricked by a snake, this is partially true as a descendant of the evil tribe had his tongue surgically altered to be forked in order to better pronounce some of the words of destruction as the purer the pronunciation the more effective the un-word becomes. Notice how the words good and evil are so similar to God and Devil? It is no coincidence.

Do you wonder why we have curse words? There are words that can curse you or others but you're too far from proper pronunciation to use them.

If you ever inexplicably bleed from the mouth but have good dental hygiene you may even have said a lesser un-word by accident without ever realizing. So many of those words are lost to us now, but they are making progress in recovering them, they listen to your conversations through the microphone on your phone and laptop, in the hopes that if you are killed through an accidental enunciation they will have recorded the word. As the saying goes enough monkeys at type writers would eventually produce the combined works of Shakespeare. So enough people spontaneously combust and the beautiful language of Enuncia will live again and bring humanity into new heights of success or new depths in depravity. Those who crave this are known only as the whisper men.

It's too late for me, the whisper men will soon break down the warded door. The whispers have turned to shouts, the shouts have turned to roars and the roars have turned to concussive booms. There is no time left, there is one thing they do not know, we of the good left clues for you in some of the most famous literally works. I can't say more than that, just be careful for if you but whisper the right words you can still stop them.

Remember, sticks and stones may break your bones but words will always be the key.

title: [HF] [FN] Sticks and stones may break my bones, But words will always kill me

question: What does the story say about angels?

answer: No answer

critique: "warped interpretations of these two mighty people appear in religious texts even now."

question: What does the story say about Enuncia?

answer: Enuncia is a weapon that saved mankind from extinction. It is a weapon of words that when heard could trick, maim, and even kill. Enuncia has two forms, those of creation and destruction. The first people had debates on which words are too powerful and which words are too cruel. A disagreement took place, and the first people split into two tribes: good and evil.

critique: The response contains extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The answer should mention the Bermuda Triangle.

critique: 'Enuncia has two forms, those of creation and destruction.' - unnecessarily reiterates the fact that Enuncia has three forms: creation, destruction, and that of creation and destruction. The dislogue flared emotions of the initial split could use a proper description.

critique: The answer should mention that the two tribes were named after the form of Enuncia they used.

question: Why do people spontaneously combust or burst like ripe grapes?

answer: They have used the words of creation or destruction without the proper training to survive speaking them.

critique: The answer should be more specific about the consequences of using the words.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The story says that people who use Enuncia without proper training can accidentally form un-words that can cause harm.

critique: "without the proper training to survive speaking them." - this is incorrect because the text never mentioned what the proper training was.

critique: The last sentence is not necessary to answer the question.

text: The answer should add that the evil were not satisfied, and they began a war with the good.

question: Summarize the main conflict in the story.

answer: The main conflict in the story is the war between the good and evil tribes. The war lasted for millennia and caused a scar in the fabric of reality. The war was started when the evil tribe was not satisfied with the good tribe's decision to use Enuncia for good. The war caused the death of thousands and left scars in the skin of the universe.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.


text:
The couple at the table next to us told us how they liked to experience local life when they travelled. The man pointed to a bottle of wine which lounged casually in an ice bucket and said _“like trying the local wine.”_

It was a bottle of Ribera del Duero. Spanish but definitely not local. There’s a massive difference.

A while back someone on Tripadvisor asked for wine recommendations on Tenerife. In six pages of replies not one person suggested a Tenerife wine.

Millions of people might visit the island each year but for many, what is actually ‘local’ can remain a bit hazy.

For anyone who wants to really go local on Tenerife when it comes to alcohol, here are six suggestions which are, relatively, easy to find.

RON MIEL

[Flavoured rum, Tenerife]
Let’s start with the one most people are likely to have tried if they’ve ever eaten in a Canarian restaurant, _ron miel_ (honey rum). Best served as chilled as ice, this is often plonked in front of you with the bill. It’s sweet and easy to drink, unlike the often throat-stripping grappa you get in some other European destinations. It’s a nice touch at the end of a meal and its pleasantly refreshing taste prompts some people to buy a bottle to take home… to store unopened in a cupboard until it’s long past its ‘drink by’ date. To me it’s quite nice as a one-off but I’d never drink it at home.

RUM CHUPITO

[Ron Guajira, Tenerife]
A _chupito_ (shot) of local rum (gold, not white) is often our preferred way to end an evening out; a friend in La Gomera got us into the habit of a _chupito_ for the road. Canary Island rums are pretty decent and there are rum factories on Gran Canaria, Tenerife and La Palma. At carnival time, huge displays of bottles of Canarian rum spring up in the island’s main supermarkets. Guajira is the Tenerife brand; however our preferred _ron dorado_ is La Palma’s Aldea rum.

MOJITO

[Mojito, Tenerife]
Thanks to the Canary Islands’ links with South America and Cuba especially, mojito is the island’s favourite cocktail. The zingy mix of rum, soda water, lime juice sugar and mint is perfect for a sultry subtropical climate. This is the cocktail you’re most likely to see scrawled on blackboards outside of bars. In some of the liveliest local bars there’s a factory like production line of bar staff making mojito after mojito for thirsty customers.

TENERIFE WINES

[Balcon Canario, Tenerife wine]
Forget Ribera de Duero and Rioja, if you’re a wine drinker get that nose right into a glass of the local vino. It took us a few years to learn to really appreciate it but now we’d choose Canarian over mainland Spanish wines every time. We’re mostly red drinkers so can’t really comment on the whites, but there’s often a far more interesting mix of flavours in good Canarian reds compared to those from the mainland. We’re clearly not alone in thinking this as Canarian wines regularly win top awards in international wine competitions. Generally speaking, for white wines pick one from a bodega in the south of the island and one from the north for reds, but that’s not always a given. Personal preferences change every so often, but there are usually bottles from Candido Hernandez Pio, Monje, El Lomo and Viña Norte bodegas in our rack.

CRAFT BEER

[Craft beer, Tenerife]
The best known local cerveza is Dorada, a light lager which slips down the throat very easily on a hot, sunny day. In truth it’s a fizzy lightweight in the world of beer. For a Tenerife beer with a stronger personality seek out one of the island’s artisan beers. In the last few years some craft micro-breweries have sprung up on the island. However, you still have to seek out a bottle from any of them. Look for labels like Tierra de Perros, Chutney’s Willie Sutton or Tacoa’s El Teide which has a slight hint of tajinaste honey.

BARRAQUITO

[Barraquito, Tenerife]
And finally a coffee with a kick, the _barraquito_ – a Tenerife drink whose stunning looks has people at the next table saying to the waiter _“I’ll have one of those”_ and whose flavour backs up its striking appearance. Said to originate in a bar in Santa Cruz, a _barraquito_ is a layered mix of milk, condensed milk, coffee, cinnamon, lemon peel and licor 43. Ordering a _barraquito_ isn’t always a straightforward affair. In some places the mix is called a _‘zaperoco’_. I’ve had instances where I’ve ordered a _barraquito_ to be told I mean a _zaperoco_. And at other times when I’ve ordered a _zaperoco_ the waiter’s replied _“you mean a barraquito.”_ To be sure you get that essential shot of licor 43 (it makes all the difference) it’s worth ordering a _‘barraquito completo’_ or _‘barraquito con todo’._

Although these are six popular local drinks there are a few more, some of which are quite obscure. But most visitors won’t come into contact with them so there’s not much point in listing them. Plus, for one reason or another, we like to hold a few things back.

  Jack is co-editor, writer and photographer for BuzzTrips and the Real Tenerife series of travel websites as well as a contributor to online travel sites and travel magazines. Follow Jack on Google+

question: What does the narrator enjoy, as stated in the text?

answer: The narrator enjoys local wine.

critique: It is omitted that the narrator also enjoys rum, mojito, and craft beer.

critique: The narrator enjoys local wine, but it's not stated that they enjoy it.

critique: The narrator only enjoys Ribera del Duero if it is local.

critique: The narrator does not enjoy local wine, but rather wine in general.

critique: The narrator enjoys wine, but he also enjoys rum and cocktails on this list, so the answer should reflect this.

question: Would the local alcohol suggestions be useful to someone who was on vacation?

answer: Yes, the suggestions are useful to someone who is on vacation.

critique: It is omitted that the suggestions are useful because the article gives an explanation about the alcohol.

critique: The answer could be clearer in its pronoun use.

critique: The answer should mention the local alcohols in question.

critique: The answer is not specific about who the suggestions are useful to.

critique: The answer should include the reason why the suggestions are useful.

critique: While the information may be useful to someone who is on vacation, the question and answer could use clearer language.


text:
“Hands”
	It began almost as soon as I woke up. In fact, it was what caused my awakening. It sounded like there was something crawling within the walls of my bedroom. Mice, I thought. I rubbed my eyes and got out of bed.
	I shower silently. I never understood people who listened to music or sang in the shower. Silence is what I liked. Even the sound of the running water made me cringe. The warm water pounded at my back. I felt something soft on my shoulder. I turned around quickly, a chill running up my spine. I turned down the cold water.
	I tried to relax again, but the chill never went away. I stepped out of the shower and over to the sink. I pulled a razor and shaving cream out of the medicine cabinet. As I closed the cabinet, I saw the towel that was hanging up drop to the floor in the mirror. I turned around quizzically. Shaking my head and sighing, I bent down to pick up the towel and put it back on the rack just as I saw something scurry across the tiled floor to the sliver of space between the opened bathroom door and the wall. Fuck, it has to be rats. I quickly finished shaving and went downstairs to the kitchen.
Starting a fresh pot of coffee, I tried to remember if I had any rat traps left somewhere. Maybe that would warm me up. I opened the door to the pantry and stood on my toes so I could see the contents of the top shelf. I saw the outline of something and reached my hand in. I felt around until my fingers ran into something soft. It moved just as I went to grab it. I jumped and stepped back. Instinctively, I put my hand over my chest to calm myself. I heard the last few drops dripping into the coffee pot. I poured myself a cup. As I sat, sipping at my coffee, I convinced myself that it was only my imagination. Imagination? Wow, I haven’t used that in years. It was hard for me to even remember the last time my mind wandered elsewhere. Well, there were those times when I- no, I won’t go into that.
	I heard a child outside, screaming with joy. I stood up and walked to the kitchen window. Pushing back the curtain, I could see the young boy running through a sprinkler. He screamed again, causing my fist to clench and jaws to lock. There was a sudden, loud crash behind me. I whipped around to find the coffee pot lying in hundreds of pieces on the floor. How had it fallen? Did the rat knock it over? I sighed and went to the hallway closet for rags and a broom.
	I threw away the broken glass, and washed the mug I had used. I decided to check the garage for something to kill this rat that kept ruining my morning. I moved past the plastic containers, which were now starting to fill up the garage, to the tools. I really needed to clean them off from the last time I used them. I rustled through a box until I found an old poison rat trap. I opened it and saw it had already been used.
	I heard the clicking of heels on the driveway outside the garage door. I sighed to myself and threw the trap away. I heard the doorbell ring and started making my way to the front door. As I was closing the garage door, I felt a tug at the bottom of my pant leg. I looked down, hoping to catch the rat red-handed, but the doorbell rang again. I huffed and stomped to the front of the house. I opened the door halfway.
	“Hi,” a young blonde woman was standing on the old welcome mat, smiling at me.
	I opened the door fully, “Hello.”
	“I just wanted to introduce myself. I just moved in next door,” she smiled and held her hand out.
	I looked down at her hand for a moment, then back up to meet her eyes. I shook her hand slowly.
	When she pulled away, I noticed her fidgeting with her bracelets, “Well, it was nice meeting you. If you ever need anything, don’t be afraid to ask.”
	I flicked my tongue across my lips, still staring at her hands. I smiled at her, “I’ll be sure to do that.”
	I closed the door silently and wiped my face with my hand. I turned around and saw grey everywhere. Rats weren’t the cause of my shake up this morning. All around me were severed hands. Shit, I left the garage door open. They began to climb up my pant legs. I tried shaking them off, but they held tight. I began swatting at them. They covered my eyes and mouth. There were just too many.

title: "Hands" a short story I wrote for my English class

question: Summarize what the narrator thinks is in their apartment.

answer: At first he believes it is mice. When he is in the shower he thinks it is rats. The narrator is so sure that it is rats that he goes out to buy poison rat traps. It is after he leaves the garage when he realizes that rats aren't the problem.

critique: "The narrator is so sure that it is rats that he goes out to buy poison rat traps. It is after he leaves the garage when he realizes that rats aren't the problem." This sentence is irrelevant and can be omitted.

critique: The narrator doesn't think it's rats when he's in the shower.

critique: It's omitted that the narrator thinks it's rats when he's in the shower.

critique: It's omitted that the narrator thinks he sees a hand in his pantry.

critique: It is omitted that the narrator thinks the rats are in the walls.

critique: The narrator doesn't think it's rats in the shower.

critique: The narrator doesn't buy poison rat traps.

question: What is the actual cause of the strange noises in the narrator's apartment?

answer: The narrator's neighbors are all severed hands.

critique: The narrator's neighbors are not severed hands.

critique: The narrator's neighbors are not the actual cause of the noises, they are the result of the narrator leaving their garage door open.

critique: The narrator's neighbors are not the actual cause of the noises.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The narrator's neighbors are not severed hands.

critique: The narrator is not the one who severed the hands.

critique: The narrator doesn't know the cause of the noises.

critique: The narrator's neighbors are not the actual cause of the strange noises. The hands are.

text: The response should include that the noises are being caused by severed hands.

category: accuracy


text:
Constructive criticism is welcomed! This is my first short story I wrote that wasn't part of a GCSE mock. I don't want to use this as an excuse but I'm not a professional writer nor do I claim to be. ( Heck , I aint even 16 for another year or so)

All names and situations are completely coincidental. And please enjoy!

KNOCK KNOCK KNOCK!
I awake to hear somebody pounding on the door. Wetting the insides of my mouth I pull on a stained shirt and some old jeans off the floor. I take another look at my double bed. One side messy and un-kept , as I had just got out of it , the other perfectly kept. I stumble to the door of my apartment and open it to find my brother, Lucas. “Always so smartly dressed.” I think to myself. “Hello Bruce.” He says quietly. I just stare at him. I can feel him looking into my lifeless eyes with pity sadness. “Hi” I say back to him; my voice also quiet. ”Come in “ I add quickly. He slowly walks in , his suit jacket draped over his arm. He stands there for a full minute before saying to me. “You’ve got to get over her you know.”  Oh how I wished he hadn’t said that. Why oh bloody why did he have to mention her?! Using all my power to repress tears all I can do is look into his sad eyes.  “She is gone , Bruce! Gone!” He says. “He’s obviously holding back tears” I think to myself. I struggle to speak ; nothing but air coming out of my mouth. Finally I manage to stutter “I-I-I know.” Suddenly my sorrow turns into anger. Anger towards Lucas for coming here. “I know” I say strongly, surprised at the volume of my voice.  “You should go back to work , it will take your mind of her.”  You've been on compassionate leave for 3 years now." He says. "My boss understands" I reply "that's not the point though ; is it?" He says patronisingly. "I'll drive you" he adds. "Oh nonono you're not driving me" I say defiantly. "OK , look just because she died in a car crash doesn't mean -" I cut him out " I'll walk it then" I say reluctantly. The next day I phone my boss to tell him I’m coming in. He tells me that's great and to be there for 6:00. I reply in the affirmative.

I leave early ,as its a long walk, and find myself surprisingly relaxed. "I've missed fresh air" I think to myself. For the past 3 years I've been a shut-in (my brother bringing me food) but now it felt good to be outside. I arrived to work to find my colleges greet me as if I've just come back from a nice holiday. I resist the urge to tell them to get lost. The mundane, button-pushing job reminded me of a time before the accident , before I'd even met her. Going back to my job of 15 years made me feel contented. Not happy. Content.

Walking home, I had felt better than I had in ages. The sun was shining and I had my suit jacket slung over my back. Then I noticed her. She was as beautiful as I'd remembered. For a second I felt every damned emotion at once, such a strange sensation. I can't move and I'm hyperventilating. She is crossing the road in front of me without a care in the world. Then I black out. I awake to find a group of people gathered around me. "You was out for five minutes, mate" a burly cockney man said , before helping me up. "N-no I'm good," I reply. I look past the people onto the road in front of me. She is gone. Even the horrible pain on the back of my head from when I blacked out couldn't stop me from thinking of her.

When I arrived at my apartment I was still thinking of nothing but what happened. I tried to rationalise it but I couldn't. I decide to go back to the street the next day to see if she turned up. "She wont " I tell myself. "Your mind was playing tricks on you!" I add. Regardless I was still going to go. The next day I waited on the street on which I'd seen her. I waited for about 15 minutes thinking of what my brother would say if he knew I was here. But then I see her. I don't freeze up and I don't faint. The whole thing feels unreal and ,well , fake. That doesn't stop me calling her name. Shouting it like a madman on a soapbox. She approaches me with a look of expectancy on her face. Normally, that would surprise me but I didn't notice I was too caught up. "How-what-aint you dea- wha-," she cuts off my stuttering. " She speaks calmly and slowly as if I'm a young child. "I love you" she says. "How did you-" I begin but again she cuts me off. "Let me explain what happened," she says. But before she can explain she starts to drift away slowly. At this point I'm confused and stressed but at the same time I'm happy. So very happy. I begin to hope we can be together. I'm smiling despite the confusion." What happened wa-" she was stopped by 3 loud knocks. Still drifting further away from me I start to realise what's going on. Again I here 3 loud knocks. They don't seem to come from any direction they're just .... There. Then I awake to hear my brother shouting through the letter box. I pull on a stained shirt and jeans and take one last look at the bed. One side messy and dirty. The other side seemingly preserved. Walking towards the door I had a weird feeling of déjà vu. "Wondering if I had again dreamed of her I open the door to find my brother there.

title: [RF] A tragedy , not a comedy.

question: Where does the narrator live?

answer: That information can't be found.

critique: It is mentioned that he lives in an apartment

critique: The narrator's brother, Lucas, comes to his apartment.

question: Why is the narrator shut into his apartment?

answer: Because his girlfriend died in a car crash.

critique: "Because his girlfriend died in a car crash" - is misleading in that Bruce's girlfriend didn't die in a car crash - it's that she "lost her life in a car crash." Big difference. Replace the old answer with how she died.

critique: The narrator is not shut into his apartment because his girlfriend died in a car crash. He is shut into his apartment because he is grieving.

critique: The narrator is not shut into his apartment. He is shut out of his apartment.

critique: The narrator is not shut into his apartment because his girlfriend died in a car crash. He is shut into his apartment because he has been on compassionate leave for three years.

critique: The narrator isn't shut into his apartment because his girlfriend died in a car crash. He's shut into his apartment because he's been on compassionate leave for three years.

text: The response is incomplete. It should also mention that the narrator is grieving.

question: What is the twist of the story?

answer: The narrator thinks he is meeting the woman of his dreams, but it turns out it was all a dream.

critique: The twist is that the narrator hallucinates the woman.

critique: The narrator does not dream of the woman.

critique: The narrator doesn't think he is meeting the woman of his dreams.

critique: Doesn't mention the woman's identity or her message.

critique: The narrator doesn't think he is meeting the woman of his dreams. He thinks he is meeting the woman of his dreams.

text: The narrator thinks he talked to his dead girlfriend, but it was only a dream.

question: Describe the narrator's brother.

answer: He is always smartly dressed. He is concerned about his brother's mental state, and tries to help him move on from his girlfriend's death.

critique: He is always smartly dressed, but this is not necessarily a quality of his character.

critique: The answer omits that the narrator's brother is always patronizing.

critique: I would add that based on the story, it's clear the narrator's brother is smart.

critique: "He is concerned about his brother's mental state, and tries to help him move on from his girlfriend's death." - this is inaccurate. The brother only gives advice, but he is not concerned about the narrator's mental state.

critique: The narrator's brother is named Lucas, not "his brother".

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator's brother is named Lucas.


text:
[Between now and the end of the year, Justin Trudeau's capacity to forge a consensus in Parliament, on the federal-provincial front and, possibly, within his own caucus will be tested as the rubber meets the road on some key campaign commitments, writes Chantal Hébert.]

[Chantal Hébert]

Chantal HébertNational Affairs Columnist

__Sat., Nov. 19, 20163 min. read

Article was updated Nov. 18, 2016

If you have been enjoying Canada’s comparatively cool political climate since Justin Trudeau became prime minister, make the most of what may be the last days of the season.

By all indications, the political temperature is about to rise as deadlines looms on three potentially troublesome fronts for the Liberal government.

Between now and the end of the year, the prime minister’s capacity to forge a consensus in Parliament, on the federal-provincial front and, possibly, within his own caucus will be tested as the rubber meets the road on some key campaign commitments.

On or before Dec. 1, the special committee that has been exploring a reform of Canada’s voting system will report its findings to the government. If the Liberals have a principled position on this issue, they have been doing a great job of keeping it under wraps.

The committee report should signal the beginning of the end of the Liberal game of hide-and-seek.

The opposition parties hold the majority at the electoral reform table and, in any event, no government is bound to implement the prescription of a committee. If such an obligation existed, Canada’s new law on medically assisted suicide would be a lot less restrictive. But if Trudeau is presented with an opposition consensus as to the way forward on the voting system he will, at a minimum, have to come up with the kind of coherent response that has been sorely lacking to date.

This week, democratic reform minister Maryam Monsef reported, on the basis of her own consultations, that there was no consensus within the public as to a preferred voting system. The representations made to the committee on the other hand have tended to favour a more proportional system. Consensus, in this instance, is very much in the opportunistic eye of the beholder. But more on that later in this column.

The odds of a majority committee report increased this week when the NDP signalled that it could support the Conservative call for any new voting system to be put to a national referendum. If there is solid majority within the electorate to be found for anything pertaining to electoral reform, it revolves around the notion that a change should be approved through a national plebiscite.

One way or another, it does seem that at least one part of Trudeau’s promise will not be fulfilled. In the still unlikely scenario that the Liberals sign off on a national plebiscite, the debate would shift to the rewriting of the federal referendum law and then to the actual holding of a national vote. Getting all that done within the time frame Elections Canada says it needs to put a different voting system in place for 2019 would be extremely difficult. And that is, of course, assuming a reform proposal wins the day.

On Dec. 9, Trudeau is tentatively scheduled to meet with the premiers to put the finishing touches on the country’s climate change strategy. The first ministers have not gathered since the prime minister signalled his intention to set a floor price on carbon. In the interval, Donald Trump’s victory and the expectation that his administration will not follow up on the Paris climate accord have added grist to the mill of opponents of a Canadian carbon tax.

Trudeau does not lack for provincial allies on carbon pricing but the same is not true of his plan to cut the annual increase of the health transfer to 3 per cent. The prime minister wants to avoid a linkage between the two files. Absent some conciliatory federal move on health-care funding, that linkage may be hard to avoid next month and not just on carbon pricing.

Dec. 19 is the deadline for the federal cabinet to decide the fate of Kinder Morgan’s plan to increase the capacity of the TransMountain pipeline. It links Alberta to the coast off Vancouver. In the wake of the American election, Energy Minister Jim Carr has argued that Trump’s victory and the prospect of a revival of the Keystone XL project did not diminish the need for more pipeline capacity in Canada.

Trudeau has long said he would not proceed with a pipeline absent a so-called social licence for the project. If his government applied to the quest of a pro-pipeline consensus in British Columbia the same loose criteria it is using to declare that there is no consensus in sight on electoral reform, the TransMountain pipeline would be dead on arrival.

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question: What does the text say about National Affairs Columnist, Chantal Hébert?

answer: No answer

text: The answer can say that Chantal Hébert is the article's author as a national affairs columnist.

question: What does the text say about Canadian Prime Minister Justin Trudeau?

answer: The text says that Canadian Prime Minister Justin Trudeau's capacity to forge a consensus in Parliament, on the federal-provincial front, and possibly within his own caucus will be tested as the rubber meets the road on some key campaign commitments. The text also says that if Trudeau is presented with an opposition consensus as to the way forward on the voting system, he will have to come up with a coherent response.

critique: The response does not mention the three areas that will test Trudeau's capacity.

question: Summarize everything that happened between December 1 to December 9.

answer: On or before December 1, the special committee that explored a reform of Canada's voting system reported its findings to Trudeau's government. December 9 was tentatively scheduled for Trudeau to meet with the premiers to put the finishing touches on the country's climate change strategy. And on December 19, the federal cabinet was expected to decide the fate of Kinder Morgan's plan to increase the capacity of the TransMountain pipeline.

critique: The answer should include that the pipeline decision is expected to be made on December 19.

text: The question asks for events on and between December 1 and December 9. Thus, the sentence about December 19 is irrelevant.

question: What does the text say about December 19th?

answer: December 19th is the deadline for the federal cabinet to decide the fate of Kinder Morgan's plan to increase the capacity of the TransMountain pipeline. It links Alberta to the coast off Vancouver. In the wake of the American election, Energy Minister Jim Carr has argued that Trump's victory and the prospect of a revival of the Keystone XL project did not diminish the need for more pipeline capacity in Canada.

critique: The response should include the fact that the pipeline is connected to the health care funding issue.

critique: The response is missing the part about the pipeline.


text:
Smoke billowed from the window of a broke-down truck that always sat at the edge of Potts farm. Nobody knew how or when the dusty behemoth of a vehicle ended up where it was. All that was known was that it had been there for years on end, never claimed and never moved. Incapable of any motion, the vehicle was often the place that delinquents and vagabonds aplenty decided to make their little niche in the world. Sitting in the front seat, Matthew Delaney smoked the Marlboro in his lips slowly.  A down-to-earth country boy, Matthew fit the part with a pair of dusty overalls and a tank top worn underneath. Scrawny to the letter and hiding his eyes behind a tangled mess of sweat-laced hair, he wasn't exactly the most attractive or noteworthy of people in the small farming colony of Plethora. A glance over brought attention to the old rifle he had stolen from his father's case. A Winchester by make, the rifle was known for its solid performance, even as old as it was. Today, it seemed, was the day that Matthew had decided to die. Another gentle puff of the cigarette brought his mind back, spiraling through the mesh of memories and thoughts he had locked away for the day. What had brought him to this point? The breakup. That's right. Amber McGraw, a girl he had been with for nearly two years had decided that they were looking at different ends of a circle. They would arrive at the same points, but regardless of how much they moved their plans around, there was never a solid corner to settle into. A shake of his head brought Matthew back to the present, a blemish of a day in his perfect plan of life. Everything he had known in the world had come to a close and there was no new chapter to this book. No sequels, no trilogy or saga to keep him wondering what came next.

Sighing, Matthew flicked the cigarette from the door and grabbed the rifle from the passenger's seat. Kicking the door as he pulled the handle, the old metal swung open with a contesting creak and squealed to rest once open halfway. Squeezing out of the narrow opening, Matthew walked to the front of the truck and leaned back. The cold metal of the grill met his back with a smack and Matthew soon found himself sliding to sit with his knees propped up. Dropping his head back, he let it rest on the truck's grill as he gazed into the night sky. Earth had been a sight back whenever he had first lived there. The large white moon above with stars littering the sky had kept him rather enraptured as a young boy. At the age of twenty-seven, however, Matthew found the night sky of Plethora to be a bit lackluster. There was no moon, only stars. The sky wasn't even that dark here. A darker shade of red, perhaps, but the early sun's rotation did little to give a working man a real moment's sleep. Shaking his head, Matthew looked down once more at the rifle he held. At least he'd be found soon. People would be out and about in an hour at the latest. Since the old “Pott's Truck” was a landmark into and out of the primary farming community that the colony was known for, someone was bound to find the poor man's body where it would undoubtedly be lying. No coyotes or decay for him. He'd at least have the dignity of a decent burial. Firming his resolve, Matthew shifted the rifle until it was placed squarely in his mouth and moved his hand towards the trigger.

Before he had even so much as touched the trigger guard, however, an explosion rocked the world around him. Wind, dust, and rocks flew towards Matthew, who was quick to drop to the side, evading a rather large rock that had been kicked up and sent his way. Forgotten was the rifle and his previous resolution, the old weapon hitting the ground with a dull clang compared to the sudden rush of noise and action around the man. Whenever his vision cleared up, Matthew went wide-eyed with disbelief. There before him, battling what Matthew had once considered friends and coworkers, was the lapdog of the Unified Colony Directorate. Aiden Desparius, a gene-soldier, was an impressive figure to find on any battlefield. Standing at just under 6 feet flat and sporting a goatee that looked as if it belonged on some cartoon villain's face, he was impressive enough without the gear he had strapped to his body armor. White flesh shifted as he dived to the side, evading a stray rifle's bullet. Muscles tightened and flexed as he punched one farmer, who dared to get close with his knife, in the nose. To see him battling a bunch of farmers and laborers was more than enough shock and confusion for Matthew, who could only watch in wonder before the desire to save his fellows overwhelmed the man's mind. Stumbling for the abandoned Winchester, Matthew raised it shakily to his shoulder and aimed at the soldier fighting his people. Unseen, he fired off the round and managed a hit. A small cheer lifted from his mouth whenever he saw Aiden crumple, one immediately copied by the farmer's around him. It died, however, whenever Aiden rose slowly from the ground. Spitting to the side, he glanced at the hole in his shoulder and turned to where the shot came from. “Mother fucker.”

They were to be the last two words Matthew heard in his current life. Seeing Aiden vanish before his eyes, Matthew gave a startled yelp and attempted to flee from where he was hunched. He had intended to kill himself that day, but now felt the very real desire to remain alive now that he had an enemy who cared enough about him to want him dead. He knew Aiden's gift, as most did, and did his best to run before the soldier reappeared. He wasn't quick enough. Aiden reappeared explosively, his body forming in midair in the space that Matthew inhabited. Vitae and organs spread like a rain, Matthew's body unable to contain the sudden stress of someone else occupying the exact space it did. The poor man's master plan for dying peacefully and with a proper funeral were shattered in the same instant that Matthew simply ceased to exist. It didn't take long for Aiden to finish his compatriots after their morale shattered, seeing such gruesome brutality.

title: Plethora

question: Summarize what happens inside the truck that Matthew is sitting in.

answer: No answer

critique: The response misses to mention that Matthew is smoking a cigarette and contemplating suicide.

critique: The answer should mention that Matthew is smoking a cigarette and contemplating suicide.

critique: The answer should mention that Matthew is smoking a cigarette.


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question: What can be stated as some beautiful locations, according to the text.

answer: Some beautiful locations that the author claims are located in Karnataka are the Serenity at the Sanapur Lake, the Zenana Enclosure, and the Underground Shiva Temple.

critique: The answer should mention the Queen's Bath, Mahanavami Dibba, and Stepped Tank.

critique: The text also mentions the Queen's Bath, the Krishn Temple, the Sasivekalu Ganesha, and the Virupaksha Temple.

critique: The answer should mention the Queen's Bath and the Vijaya Vittala Temple.

question: Who would benefit from reading about all these temples?

answer: People who are interested in history and art.

critique: The answer should be more specific about the type of people who would benefit from reading about all these temples.


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Reducing the money wasted on unprofitable media will be at the heart of L’Oréal’s advertising plans in 2018.

There is still “a lot of waste” in the media the advertiser buys, admitted Stéphane Bérubé, L’Oréal’s CMO for Western Europe. But unlike Procter & Gamble, Unilever and other big advertisers, L’Oréal has no intention of slashing its spend online to weed out ineffective ads. Instead, the cosmetics giant will spend more online next year, as it has over the last 12 months. It’s where the company’s ads appear that will impact ad waste, not how much it spends, explained Bérubé, who is warming to the idea that greater relevance comes at a premium. “I prefer to pay more sometimes to get the quality audiences rather than a cheap CPM,” he said.

To avoid cheap impressions, L’Oréal’s budgets are moving from open exchanges into private marketplaces, Bérubé said. In some markets, the advertiser is going directly to publishers to curate its own private marketplaces, a shift reliant on first-party data from areas such as L’Oréal’s limited e-commerce sales alongside data from publishers. Consequently, third-party data is becoming less important to the company’s campaigns, Bérubé said.

L’Oréal’s pullback from CPMs dates back to 2014, when it decided to buy display ads that are 70 percent in view on publisher sites. It would be too costly and restrictive on reach if those ads were 100 percent in view, the advertiser previously said. For video ads, the advertiser has been buying those that run through to completion, rather than paying for all impressions.

Buying viewable impressions was the main way the advertiser tried to curb wastage three years ago, whereas now it’s part of a wider shift to more addressable media buys, said Bérubé. In other words, L’Oréal is catching on to the value of people-based advertising, turning its first-party data into more effective campaigns. “We’re reviewing all our audience profiles,” Bérubé said. “We need to collect as much data as possible to be relevant to consumers.”

Understanding that wealth of data is easier said than done. In addition to examining return on investment and attribution modeling, L’Oréal’s marketers are also trying to understand some of the more opaque costs of its advertising such as cost per acquisition, consumer lifetime value and the value of cookies. L’Oréal is also hiring data experts to help make sense of the company’s customer data and question existing media practices. In some cases, data privacy experts are vetting technology and service providers. L’Oréal must bring more experts — not just in data — in-house, said Bérubé, not to replace agencies but to challenge them to be less “complacent” and to nurture their own specializations.

The topic of in-house talent versus agency expertise sparked frank comments from Bérubé at the Ad:tech London conference last month. L’Oréal isn’t trying to “kill the agency” by shaping its own media strategy, Bérubé assured delegates at the event. As dedicated to nurturing its own media expertise as L’Oréal is, Bérubé concedes it will never be able to plan and buy media at the scale an agency could. “Even if I have my have own [trading] desk internally, we’re never going to buy 100 million impressions,” he said. “The reason we’re doing this [in-housing talent] is to understand [our media investments]. If I have no clue about media, then how can I challenge my agency to do a good job?”

Bérubé believes another potential benefit of L’Oréal’s agencies leading media strategy is better remuneration. He said the advertiser plans to overhaul the way it remunerates agencies in many markets, moving away from models that view media as a commodity. “We need to go from treating it [media] as a commodity to be much more of a quality buy because agencies were just being incentivized to buy cheap media, whether that was on TV or online,” Bérubé said.

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Source: MediaRadar
L’Oréal’s crackdown on wastage helps explain its focus on the so-called long tail of advertising. In the last quarter, the advertiser not only increased its online spend in the U.S. versus the same period a year ago (as the chart above shows), but also the number of publisher sites its ads appeared on. According to a study by ad-tracking firm MediaRadar, L’Oréal, like P&G over a similar period, has become more confident in a supply chain that has forced some advertisers to reluctantly reduce their spend. The data doesn’t reveal how many of those ads are on cheap sites versus premium ones, however, meaning L’Oréal could still be prioritizing reach over content and context.

Bérubé claimed otherwise: “We have better visibility now on who is and who isn’t a real person [online]. I can tell you that we’re comfortable continuing to invest [in digital].”

_Image courtesy of L’Oréal._

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question: Summarize everything relating to waste.

answer: L'Oreal is reducing the money wasted on unprofitable media. They are moving away from CPMs. They are also trying to understand some of the more opaque costs of its advertising such as cost per acquisition, consumer lifetime value, and the value of cookies.

critique: The answer omits the company's move to private marketplaces.

critique: The response misses to mention that L'Oreal is trying to understand the more opaque costs of its advertising in order to curb wastage.

critique: The response misses to mention that L'Oreal is moving away from cheap impressions and into private marketplaces.

critique: The answer omits that L'Oreal is moving away from third-party data.

critique: The answer should mention the company's focus on the long tail.

critique: Doesn't address the waste in ad spending.

question: What does the article say about effective advertising?

answer: The article says that L'Oreal is moving away from CPMs and into private marketplaces. This is to avoid cheap impressions. The company is also moving away from third-party data. The company is also trying to understand some of the more opaque costs of advertising.

critique: The article does not say anything about effective advertising.

critique: The article does not say that L'Oreal is moving away from third-party data.

critique: The answer should mention the company's focus on people-based advertising.

critique: The article also says that L'Oreal is moving away from third-party data to focus on its own first-party data to make its advertising more effective.

critique: The answer does not mention the company's focus on people-based advertising.

critique: The answer omits that L'Oreal is trying to understand the value of people-based advertising.

critique: The article does not say that L'Oreal is moving away from CPMs and into private marketplaces. This is to avoid cheap impressions. The company is also moving away from third-party data. The company is also trying to understand some of the more opaque costs of advertising.

question: What does the article say about L'Oréal's advertising plans for 2019?

answer: No answer

critique: There is no answer because the article doesn't mention anything about L'Oreal's advertising plans for 2019.

critique: The article does not mention anything about L'Oreal's advertising plans for 2019.

critique: The article does not mention L'Oreal's advertising plans for 2019.


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"Look, do you want this stuff or not?"

"I dunno. Most of it isn't useful. I could probably only sell about a third of it."

"So how much will you pay for that third?"

"Honestly, not much. Like I said, it's not very useful stuff."

"How much? $100?"

"No, that's way too much. You could probably get that much, or maybe even more, if you sold it yourself, but I can't pay you that much. I need to make a profit off of this."

"I don't wanna go through the hassle of selling it all myself, that's why I am talking to you. How about $85?"
"Still too high for me."

"$75?"

"Why are you so eager to get rid of this stuff Mike?"

"I don't have room for it, I just need it gone."

"Don't have room for it? Mike, you have been in prison for 5 years. You just got out yesterday. I'm surprised that you even have this much stuff. Where did it come from? Did you have it in storage all of that time?"

"Don't worry about where it came from, just tell me if you want it."

"Are you alright man?"

"No, I'm not alright, I'm getting really annoyed with you. Do you or do you not want to buy this pile of crap? I'll even lower it to $65 if you just say yes right now."

"I need to know where these things came from. I can't be caught with stolen goods and I don't want to see you go back to jail."

"No, you don't need to know where these things came from. People don't come to your pawn shop looking for beautiful antiques with rich histories. They come because the items are cheap and there are no questions asked. Where I got this stuff shouldn't matter to you. Besides, even if this stuff is stolen, it's not like that has ever been an issue for you before."

"Okay fine, you're right, I have sold stolen goods before. But that is not the issue right now. What I want to know is if YOU stole these things."

"Why does it matter?"

"Because Mike, you're my friend. We grew up together. We both worked hard and we left home together and got away from that dead-end life. Don't throw it all away now. You just spent 5 years in jail for stealing. If you get caught again you will be in for a lot longer. We fought so hard to get off the reservation because everywhere we looked all we saw were old men sitting around just waiting to die. If you go back to jail you will be doing the exact same thing, just sitting around waiting for your time to come. Look, I need to know, did you steal that stuff?"

"$60?"

"Did. You. Steal it?"

"$55?"

"Answer me Mike"

"$50? Come on man, I really need the cash. Like you said, we're friends, we grew up together. I really need your help right now. Can you help me? Friend?"

"You did steal it, didn't you?"

"$50 is a good deal man. Look at this stuff in here. Some of this will be sold by tomorrow, and for a good price. Look. You could sell this ring alone for $40. Like you said, I could sell this stuff myself and make over $100, but I'm coming to you instead. Help me out with this man. You will easily get your money back."

"I can't do it Mike. I can't sell things that you've stolen"

"You never had a problem with it before! What's changed?! Are you scared? You saw me go to jail and now you think it will happen to you?"

"If I sell things that you have stolen then I am supporting your theft, and I can't do that."

"What, are you scared that if I get caught I will rat on you for reduced time? I would NEVER do that, and you know it! I didn't rat on you last time, and I went away for five years man, five years! You know me, you know I wouldn't say anything! I need some money and I am asking you, my friend, for help and all you can think about is yourself. All you can think about is 'selling stolen goods'."

"That's not what I mean Mike."

"Yeah? Then tell me, what do you mean?"

"If I sell things that you have stolen then I am just encouraging you to steal more. We have been down this road before and we saw how it ended. You were in prison for 5 years. How long do you think it will be next time? I can't do it Mike. I can't help you throw your life away. I won't sell anything that you have stolen."

"Yeah? well you know what? Don't worry about it. Don't worry about helping me, FRIEND. You don't have to worry about helping me throw my life away, because I won't be bothering you any more."

"Don't be like that Mike. You know I want to help you, but I won't do it in this way."

"No, really, don't worry about it. I guess I'll see you around some time."

That was the last time I spoke with Mike. Three weeks later he was caught by the police and sent back to jail. I guess he stole from some bad people, because on his second day in prison he was stabbed and killed. I guess, in the end, he succeeded. He didn't just sit around waiting to die, and that was all he ever really wanted.

title: Not a writer, but I decided to try a prompt from youshouldwrite.com just for fun. Tell me what you think. ~900 words

question: Summarize everything relating to Mike's experience in jail.

answer: Mike spent the last five years in jail. He just got out after having stolen things. He grew up with the narrator, as they both worked hard and left home together to get away from their dead-end lives.

critique: The narrator and Mike didn't grow up together.

critique: The narrator and Mike did not grow up together; they both left home together.

critique: The narrator and Mike grew up together, but the narrator didn't go to jail.

critique: The narrator and Mike left their reservation together.

critique: The narrator did not work hard growing up.

critique: It is omitted that Mike is killed in jail.

critique: The narrator's life is irrelevant to the question.

question: Summarize the main conflict.

answer: Mike asks the narrator for a lot of money for a pile of stuff he's selling, many of which are probably stolen. The narrator asks Mike where he got it and Mike gets angry and says he didn't steal it. The narrator doesn't want to buy the things Mike stole since it's encouraging him to steal more, and they don't want Mike to end up back in jail.

critique: The narrator doesn't want to buy the things Mike stole because it's encouraging him to steal more.

critique: The narrator doesn't want to buy the things Mike stole because he doesn't want to encourage him to steal more.

critique: "The narrator asks Mike where he got it and Mike gets angry and says he didn't steal it." - is inaccurate. Mike never denied stealing the goods.

critique: The narrator's problem isn't with the money Mike is asking for, it's with the fact that the goods are stolen.

critique: This is a misrepresentation of what the narrator says. He won't sell Mike's stolen items specifically because it'd encourage him to steal more. The narrator repeatedly implies this is his reasoning.Finally, he also clearly says he can't support Mike's theft.

critique: The narrator doesn't want to buy the things Mike stole since it's encouraging him to steal more, and they don't want Mike to end up back in jail. - this is irrelevant and should be removed.

question: Summarize how the pawn shop owner feels about Mike.

answer: The pawn shop owner is Mike's friend. He grew up with Mike and they both left home together. He wants to help Mike, but he doesn't want to support Mike's theft. He doesn't want to see Mike go back to jail, and he doesn't want Mike to throw his life away. He's concerned that if Mike goes back to jail, he'll just be sitting around waiting to die.

critique: The narrator is concerned that if Mike goes back to jail, he'll just be sitting around waiting to die.

critique: The narrator's concern about Mike's life is expressed awkwardly.

critique: The narrator's feelings aren't expressed as well as they could be.

critique: The narrator's concerns about Mike going back to jail are irrelevant to the question.

question: Summarize the pawn shop owner's reasoning in not buying Mike's items.

answer: The pawn shop owner is Mike's childhood friend and they both grew up together. Mike has just gotten out of jail for stealing, and the pawn shop owner is worried that if Mike steals again, he will go to jail for a long time. The pawn shop owner is also worried that if he buys the items, he is encouraging Mike to steal more.

critique: The answer omits the final reason that the pawn shop owner gives for not buying Mike's items.

critique: The answer omits the fact that the pawn shop owner is also worried that if he buys the items, he is encouraging Mike to steal more.

critique: The answer omits the fact that the pawn shop owner is also concerned about the legality of the items.

critique: The owner's reasoning is more complex than this.

critique: The answer omits the pawn shop owner's concern about the origin of the items.

question: What does the story say about the effects of prison on mental health?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer can't be found in the passage.

critique: The story does not explicitly discuss the effects of prison on mental health.

critique: Because the question suggests that this information is explicitly stated, there is no room for a deductive conclusion.