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HENDRIK HERP[1] (died 22 February 1477), known in Latin as HENRICUS HARPHIUS,[2] was a Dutch or Flemish Franciscan of the Strict Observance, and a writer on mysticism.

Life

Herp was born around 1400 either at Erp near Veghel[3] or Erps-Kwerps near Leuven. He is possibly the same person as _Heinricus Erppe, clericus Cameracensis dioceses_, who in 1426, as one of the first students, was registered at the University of Leuven.[4] “Clericus Cameracensis dioceses” means that this student had held a clerical position in the diocese of Kamerijk, leading some to propose that he was not born in Erp, which is widely believed to be his birthplace but belonged to the diocese of Liège, but in Erps near Leuven, which was near the edge of the diocese of Kamerijk.[5] The first undisputed reference to his life is in 1445, when he is rector of the Brethren of the Common Life at Delft, suggesting that he had previously joined the Brethren, either in Zwolle or Deventer.[6] The next year he founded a Brethren community in nearby Gouda, which he led until 1450, “to the great good of his subjects”.[7] In Gouda, Herp had extensive contact with Franciscans, and in 1450, on a pilgrimage to Rome, he took the habit of St. Francis, joining the Franciscan Observance (the Capuchin reform) at the Convent of Ara Cœli.[8] On his return to the Low Countries in 1454, he served as the guardian of the Franciscan convent in Mechelen until 1457.[9] In 1460 he was guardian of a convent in Antwerp.[10] He later served in several posts for the Franciscan Cologne Province, which covered much of the Northern Netherlands, including as Provincial superior (1470–73). Under his leadership, convents were started in Bolsward, Amersfoort and Herentals.[11] Herp traveled a lot, having meetings (_kapittels_) in Gouda in 1471, in Alkmaar in 1472, and in Bergen op Zoom in 1473. At the latter meeting Henricus de Bercha is chosen as his successor.[12] In 1474 he returns as guardian of the convent of Mechlin, where he died in 1477.[13]

Works

Herp wrote his works between 1450 and 1475. An early work is called _The Contemplative Eden_.

This is succeeded by his major work, probably written in the 1460s, entitled _Spieghel der volcomenheit_ (_The Mirror of Perfection_). As a whole and in the chief divisions of his doctrine, Herp shows several points of contact with his fellow Brabantian John of Ruusbroec.[14]

Later reception

This work was widely read: the modern edition of the text uses 48 manuscripts and lists 66 edition in many languages, beginning with the first Dutch printing in 1475. Much of this diffusion was due to the Latin translation prepared by the Cologne Carthusian Peter Blomeveen, published in 1509 under the title _Aureum directorum contemplativorum_ (_The Golden Directory of Contemplatives_).[15]

In 1538, the Cologne Carthusians, led by Dietrich Loher, also published an anthology of Herp’s writings under the title _De mystica theologica_ (_On Mystical Theology_), with a dedication to George Skotborg, Bishop of Lund. This anthology comprises three parts: “Soliloquium divini Amoris”, “Directorium Aureum contemplativorum”, and “Paradisus contemplativorum”. In other words, the Latin translation of _The Mirror_ comprised book two. This edition was important for the later reception of Herp, since it was reprinted five times before 1611, and translated into French and German.[16]

However, Herp’s work was not always received positively – in 1559, the 1556 edition of _De mystica theologica_, dedicated to Ignatius Loyola by Loher, was placed on the _Index of Forbidden Books_ for a number of theological errors (though not heresies). This was renewed in 1580 and 1583. Many still found the book useful, however. In 1586 a version corrected by the Dominican theologian Peter Paul Philippus (d. c.1648) was printed in Rome.[17] There is also an “Index Expurgatorius” (Paris, 1598), where can be found, as well as in the “Index of Sotomayor” (1640), the opinions to be corrected.

He was praised by Mabillon, Bona, and others. Of his works, only one was printed during his lifetime, _Speculum aureum decem præceptorum Dei_ (Mainz, 1474); it is a collection of 213 sermons on the Commandments for the use of preachers and confessors. Another collection of 222 sermons (Sermones de tempore, de sanctis, etc.) was printed in 1484, etc. Both frequently quote the Doctors of the Middle Ages, especially Thomas Aquinas, Alexander of Hales, Bernard of Clairvaux, etc., and were often reprinted.

Influence

Some of the early modern mystics who knew and used Herp include Francisco de Osuna, Bernardino de Laredo, Angelus Silesius, Benet Canfield, Augustine Baker, the author of _The Evangelical Pearl_, Louis de Blois, Cardinal Berulle, Constantine Barbanson, and John of Saint-Samson.[18]

The Franciscan Chapter of Toledo in 1663 recommended his works as standard writings in mystic theology.

The _Franciscan Martyrology_ of Arturus of Rouen gives him the title of Blessed.

Footnotes

[1] Also HARP or ERP.

[2] Also HENDRICUS DE HERP, HENRICUS HERPIUS or HARPIUS, and CITHAROEDUS.

[3] Hendrik Herp at the Digital Library for Dutch Literature

[4] Dlabačová, p. 29

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[6] Dlabačová, p. 28,30-32

[7] Dlabačová, p. 32-40

[8] Dlabačová, p.40-42

[9] Dlabačová, p.40-42,50

[10] Dlabačová, p.50

[11] Dlabačová, p.53

[12] Dlabačová, p.54

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[14] Dlabačová, p.57, Chapter Seven

[15] McGinn, p. 130.

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[17] McGinn, p. 131.

[18] McGinn, p. 533.

title: Hendrik Herp

question: What does the text say about Hendrik Herp's life?

answer: Hendrik Herp was born around 1400 at Erp near Veghel or Erps-Kwerps near Leuven. He is possibly the same person as Heinricus Erppe, clericus Cameracensis dioceses, who in 1426 was registered at the University of Leuven. He was rector of the Brethren of the Common Life at Delft in 1445, and founded a Brethren community in nearby Gouda the next year. He took the habit of St. Francis in 1450 and joined the Franciscan Observance. He served as the guardian of the Franciscan convent in Mechelen until 1457. In 1460 he was guardian of a convent in Antwerp. He served in several posts for the Franciscan Cologne Province until 1473. He traveled a lot, having meetings in Gouda in 1471, in Alkmaar in 1472, and in Bergen op Zoom in 1473. He died in 1477.

critique: "He is possibly the same person as Heinricus Erppe, clericus Cameracensis dioceses, who in 1426 was registered at the University of Leuven." - this is irrelevant and should be removed.

critique: The answer should mention that Herp wrote his works between 1450 and 1475.

critique: The answer should mention his reception.

critique: The answer omits the fact that Herp wrote his works between 1450 and 1475.

critique: "He is possibly the same person as Heinricus Erppe, clericus Cameracensis dioceses, who in 1426 was registered at the University of Leuven." - this was never implied in the passage and should be deleted.

question: What does the text say about Hendrik Herp's work?

answer: Hendrik Herp wrote his works between 1450 and 1475. His early work is called The Contemplative Eden. His major work, probably written in the 1460s, is called The Mirror of Perfection. The Mirror of Perfection was widely read and was translated into many languages. It was placed on the Index of Forbidden Books for a number of theological errors.

critique: The answer should mention the reception of the work.

critique: The Mirror of Perfection was not translated into many languages. It was translated into French and German.

critique: The answer omits that Herp was praised by Mabillon, Bona, and others.

critique: The Mirror of Perfection was not the only work placed on the Index of Forbidden Books.

critique: The answer omits mention of the 1559 edition of The Mirror of Perfection.

critique: The answer omits that Herp's work was praised by Mabillon, Bona, and others.

text: The Mirror of Perfection was not the book placed on the Index of Forbidden Books. Rather, that was the 1556 edition of _De mystica theologica_, dedicated to Ignatius Loyola by Loher.

question: What does the text say about Herp's private life?

answer: No answer

critique: The article does not mention anything about Herp's private life.

critique: This response needs to be revised because it is incorrect and is missing the most important aspect of Herp's private life which are when and where he was born.

critique: The text does mention Herp's private life.

critique: The text does talk about Herp's private life.


split: train

text:
Alright. Today is the day. I feel inspired, I feel motivated. I can put pen to paper and finally hash out the first chapter to my next novel. A short thriller with a dash of dark humor, a comedic tragedy of sorts. Something that will leave the readers with a sense of ambiguity. Laptop is on, WordWriter 20xx is open, and now here comes...

*High atop the cityscape sat Jane. A reporter of sorts, Jane ran a blog -*

Hm... Maybe not Jane... I knew a Jane back in grade school. She was pretty and sweet, definitely smart, and we had an estranged friendship of sorts. Ah, who cares. That was so long ago and I hardly even knew her.

*A reporter of sorts, Jane ran a blog reporting on the video game industry. Her stall was in the middle of the aisle -*

I wonder what became of Jane? I think we went to different middle schools, that or we just never saw each other again. Oh, there's also the Jane Park I met in high school. Mildly overweight, dumb, and bossy. Being stuck with her in the Physics lab was probably what stifled my dreams of becoming the next Bill Nye. Heh, imagine me as a "Science Guy" of all things. Maybe I should change the name, this is getting too distracting.

*High atop the cityscape sat Sarah. A reporter of sorts, Sarah ran a blog reporting on the video game industry. Her stall was in the middle of the aisle, her body cramped between an overweight and visibly uncomfortable salesman and tomboyish young woman. Her laptop was -*

Sarah. I can't use Sarah. My memories of Sarah Bellevue are still too fresh despite the decade that has passed. There were other girls before her, there have been a few women since, but I never wronged any of them the way I did Sarah. That was the first heart I ever broke and it wasn't until years had gone by that I realized what I had done. I have no remorse toward what happened, nor do I pity her for what transpired after, but I am haunted by the idea of my naivety at the time. I admit, that is cold, but... Okay. Not Sarah.

*High atop the cityscape sat -*

Rachel? No, I knew a Rachel in College.

Michelle? Nope. My assistant is named Michelle.

Ashley? Cousin's daughter.

Carmen... Liana... Eleni? Amber. Jasmine. Aisha... Jenny? No too close to Jennifer. Christine... is my mother's name.

Mandy. Marilyn. Brittany? Tiffany. Candace. Nope, nope, nope, dated a Tiffany, nope.

BrandyHeatherChanningBriannaAmberSerenaMelodyDakotaSierraBambiCrystalSamanthaAutumRubyTaylorTaraTammyLaurenCharleneChantelleCourtneyMistyJennyKristaMindyNoelShelbyTrinaRebaCassandraNikkiKelseyShawnaJoleneUrleenClaudiaSavannahCaseyDollyKendraKylieChloeDevonEmmalou... Becky?

*High atop the cityscape sat Becky -*

Okay clearly not Becky. Becky is the name of my neighbor's overly rebellious daughter. Maybe I should just switch up the sex to move things along.

*High atop the cityscape sat John. A reporter of sorts, John ran a blog reporting on the video game -*

Oh... I forgot... John killed himself a few years ago. Of all the times to think about him... When was the last time I even saw him? His sister's wedding? Amber had been dropping hints to me to try to reconnect with him but things had just become to strained after his divorce with Amy. I guess he shouldn't have been too surprised to have caught her cheating on him given the way they had first met. I can't even remember the last thing I said to him... Twenty years of growing up together. Five years growing apart. Three years without him at all. I never sought closure after his death. I never asked the reason. I never guessed the reason. I accepted the news and carried on with my life. It was like when my mother mentioned to me that my elementary school had been torn down and the property was now empty. A part of me pined for the memories but not enough to become concerned about it. Maybe I should give Amber a call. But, for now, let's try another name.

*High atop the cityscape sat Phillip. A reporter of sorts, Phillip ran a blog reporting on the video game industry. His stall was in the middle of the aisle, his body cramped between an overweight and visibly uncomfortable salesman and tomboyish young woman. His laptop was dimly illuminated to maintain the unrealistic ideal of privacy as he skimmed over the notes he had prepared for the convention. Phillip had become popular enough to draw the attention of several notable industry leaders and was given an all-expense paid trip to report on behalf of the convention runners, GamenCorp -*

Phillip used to play football in high school. I can't remember if he kept playing in college or not, I think maybe he was injured? I'm pretty sure he and Amber were still friends in college, maybe I should ask her when I... No... I probably shouldn't call her at all. There is undoubtedly a reason why we lost touch after John left us. I don't know the reason, but I accept that there has to be one. Thirty minutes and I've hardly touched the keyboard now. Maybe I should just take a break.

*High atop the cityscape sat PLACEHOLDER. A reporter of sorts, PLACEHOLDER ran a blog reporting on the video game industry. PLACEHOLDER stall was in the middle of the aisle, PLACEHOLDER body cramped between an overweight and visibly uncomfortable salesman and tomboyish young woman. PLACEHOLDER laptop was dimly illuminated to maintain the unrealistic ideal of privacy as PLACEHOLDER skimmed over the notes PLACEHOLDER had prepared for the convention. PLACEHOLDER had become popular enough to draw the attention of several notable industry leaders and was given an all-expense paid trip to report on behalf of the convention runners, GamenCorp, to local media outlets and an exclusive video series.*

^(^(that feel when trying to pick a name for a character))

title: [RF] Any other name

question: What is the feeling that the writer is trying to convey to the reader?

answer: The feeling is that we have all met many people in life who have had an influence on our lives, are all part of the tapestry of who we are and that it can be very difficult to come up with a creative name for all our characters.

critique: The answer is not related to the question.


text:
	I had never sat in a cafe and wrote before. It was a phenomenon of Portland and other easy going cities like it: young people, with nothing better to do, would just go to the local cafe and waste the day away at a computer (or typewriter, depending on how hip the cafe was). I had always enjoyed writing, but writer's block had always hit sooner or later, and not a single story was complete so far. So there I was, school had just finished and I felt aimless. I decided to go up to the corner cafe that just opened on my street. It was a cute little green building, hidden between two giant trees, leafless from winter. I stepped inside and instantly, the smell of warm coffee and sandwiches hit my nose. It was like a large living room, soft music was playing, there was a younger Asian guy reading on a green and yellow couch, and a young woman with an apron stood at a front desk. I examined the menu, chose some finger food, and set up my computer to write. Opening up the word program, I see the recent category, filled with the stories I've yet to finish. Looking at all this unfinished work, I promise myself that I will have made something by the end of the day. “I have to”, I tell myself, “I have to finish one damn story”.

	But what do I write about? That's the question I kept asking. Over and over and over, I could not think of one damn thing! I had never had this trouble with technical papers or papers for school, given a topic or general theme, I could do A work every time, but ask me to craft a story and I just can't. It's like my mind hits a brick wall, so much momentum but no progress. I looked for inspiration everywhere, and found none. How do I write about the guy walking his dog past the window I'm sitting at? What is funny or interesting about that?  Nothing, that's what. So I sat there, eating the fries I ordered, trying to get past this mental wall. I put on my headphones, kicked on some MGMT, and thought.

	Time passed, I don't know how long, and I hadn't written a thing. I sat there defeated, the simple objective of writing a story had beat me. I started to gather my things to leave when I noticed something... odd. Everyone was gone. At first I thought that I was simply the last customer, so I packed everything up and went to walk out the door, but it was locked. I didn't remember seeing the waitress lock it, so was puzzling. I tried to undo the bolt, but it was stuck and didn't want to budge. I didn't want to break the lock, so I went to find the waitress, but she was nowhere to be found. In fact, nobody was here, I was the only person in the cafe. Not caring about a stupid lock anymore, I pushed the lock to the breaking point and it finally slid to the open position. I swung the door open.... but there was nothing there. No street, no houses, no trees, just a huge, blank space. I couldn't tell what was up or down, or how far the end was, I had to close the door to keep from throwing up. I was in shock, how could I be seeing everything normal through the window and then... nothing....

	It's been a few days here, and I still don't know what happened. I can't leave, as the outside world only exists through these panes of glass now. Stepping out the front door puts me at the back door, and vice versa.  I can't explain the physics, or what/who put me here, but I know it has something to do with my stories. I have this... I don't know how to explain it.... nagging sensation in the bag of my head. I feel compelled to finish the story I set out to write, 2 days ago, before this all started happening. I set my computer back up, opened up the file, and stared at the page. Before I had come to wherever “this” is, I had deleted everything I had wrote so far, so the page was blank. Once again I asked myself that question: What do I write about?
	I sat and thought about the past two days, all that had happened. It was crazy, like a horror story... story....the realization dawned on me like a sack of hammers, I should write about what had happened! It had everything that I needed for a story, rising action, falling action, plot twists! It just needed two things, an introduction and a conclusion. So I clicked on the word page, flexed my hands, and began to write.

	“I had never sat in a cafe and wrote before.”

title: [MF] The Cafe

question: Summarize the narrator's struggles.

answer: The narrator had never sat in a cafe and wrote before. They had always enjoyed writing but had writer's block. They decide to go to the corner cafe and write but they can't think of anything to write about. They decide to write about the guy walking his dog past the window they are sitting at, but they can't think of anything funny or interesting about that.

critique: The narrator's struggles are not fully summarized.

critique: The narrator is able to think of something to write about, they decide to write about their experience of being stuck in a cafe that is now a blank space.

critique: The narrator is not the same person as the narrator in the story.

critique: Finally, the narrator sits down at the cafe - so they've neither sat in a cafe and wrote before ("never") nor have they always enjoyed writing ("had always").

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator finds themselves trapped in the cafe.

critique: The narrator doesn't decide to write about the dogwalker, they write about the cafe disappearing.

critique: The narrator is not struggling to write about the guy walking his dog past the window.

question: Summarize how this struggle is resolved.

answer: The narrator is sitting in the cafe, trying to write a story, but they can't think of anything to write about. They are the only person in the cafe, and they realize that they should write about what happened to them. They begin writing, and the story begins to flow.

critique: The narrator is not the only person in the cafe when they realize they should write about what happened to them. They are the only person there when they begin writing.

question: Summarize this method of writing.

answer: This style of writing seems to be highly individual. The narrator doesn't have anybody to bounce ideas off of or help with craft, so they sit there and say whatever comes to mind.

critique: The narrator is not alone. There are other people in the cafe.

critique: The narrator is not writing in a cafe, he is writing in a cafe.

critique: The narrator does not have anyone to bounce ideas off of or help him with the story.

critique: The narrator is not writing in a cafe, they are writing a story about their experience in a cafe.

critique: The answer should mention the narrator's inability to write.

critique: This is not stated. There is no mention of any form of help.

critique: The narrator is not writing in a cafe, they are writing in a cafe.

critique: The narrator is not doing this alone. He or she is sitting in a cafe.

text: The question is asking the style of the writing that the writer used to create the narrative. It is not asking how the style of writing that the narrator uses.

category: coverage

question: Summarize what led the narrator to want to pursue writing in the first place.

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator has always enjoyed writing.


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JULIAN DASHPER (29 February 1960 in Auckland, New Zealand – 30 July 2009), was regarded as one of New Zealand's most well known contemporary artists.

In 2001 he was awarded a senior Fulbright fellowship to be based as an artist in residence at the Chinati Foundation in Marfa, Texas. Dashper's work from the last 25 years has recently been the subject of a major touring retrospective in America (the first ever such exhibition for a resident New Zealand artist),[1] curated by Christopher Cook and David Raskin.[2]

Dashper's work focuses on the histories, theories and more general or popular ideas of abstraction (in particular abstract painting), conceptualism and minimalism as a working methodology. The geographical positioning of New Zealand globally and how this country receives and disseminates visual information is also a core subject in Dashper's work.[3] His practice manifests itself in various forms, including paintings, unique photographs of paintings, found objects which he infuses with abstract images, various multiples plus limited edition CD and 12" polycarbonate recordings of impromptu performances he has been involved with or heavily orchestrated. He has also produced a number of video works, some of which document or describe his installations, painting and audio recordings.[4] In 2016, arts organisation Circuit commissioned George Clark to curate a programme of moving image works, titled _This is not film-making_, which invited artists Gavin Hipkins, Juliet Carpenter and Gregory Kan, Daniel Malone, Louise Menzies and Nathan Gray to make works that respond to Dashper's own writings.[5]

Respectful, even affectionate references to local culture and art history are always present in Dashper's work, whilst his own adaptations of abstraction, conceptualism and minimalism fully acknowledge their lineage within international art. As curator (and director of the Adam Art Gallery in Wellington) Christina Barton expresses it, Dashper has _“the unique perspective of attending to an internationalist art history from a distance, enabling him to devise strategies to work around his geographical isolation whilst simultaneously articulating its effects.”_[6] Dashper is represented in all the major public collections in New Zealand: MCA, Sydney; Ludwig Forum für Internationale Kunst, Aachen, Germany; Sheldon Museum of Art, Lincoln, Nebraska; The University of Auckland Art Collection; Ulrich Museum of Art, Wichita, Kansas and the Stedelijk Museum in Amsterdam.

Visiting scholar at the University of Sydney in 2008, Dashper lived in Auckland and travelled regularly. His first New Zealand retrospective, _Julian Dashper: Professional Practice_, was held at the Gus Fisher Gallery in 2010.

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_UNTITLED (THE WARRIORS)_ 1998. Vinyl on drumheads with junior drumkit. Dimensions variable. Courtesy of the artist, Sue Crockford Gallery, Auckland and Kaliman Gallery, Sydney. Photo by Ashley Barber.

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title: Julian Dashper

question: How are digital images treated in the United States in terms of copyright and ownership?

answer: No answer

critique: No response is provided and a response needs to be written.

critique: The response misses to mention that pictures used to describe a three dimensional work of art are exempted per copyright law.

critique: The answer is not relevant to the question.

critique: The answer cannot be found by searching the document.


text:
[U.S. Customs and Border Protection Form 6059B (arrival card)] [The Singapore embarkation card contains a warning to visitors about the death penalty. Warning signs are found at the Malaysia-Singapore border and all airports]

An ARRIVAL CARD, also known as an INCOMING PASSENGER CARD, LANDING CARD or DISEMBARKATION CARD, is a legal document used by immigration authorities of many countries to obtain information about incoming passenger not provided by the passenger's passport (such as health, criminal record, where they will be staying, purpose of the visit, etc.) and to provide a record of a person's entry into the country.[1][2][3][4] The card may also provide information on health and character requirements for non-citizens entering the country.[5] Some countries require an arrival card for each incoming passenger, while others require one card per family unit, and some only require an arrival card for non-citizens only.

Some countries, such as Singapore and Thailand, attach a departure card to the arrival card, which is retained in the alien's passport until their eventual departure. The arrival card can also be combined with a customs declaration, which some countries require incoming passengers to fill out separately.

Some countries, such as Malaysia,[6] do not require an arrival or departure card. The procedure of compiling information from immigration cards is no longer required by United States authorities following the introduction of the biometric recording system by the United States Customs and Border Protection.[7][8] There is minimal cross-border formality between a number of countries, most notably those in the passport-free travel area of Europe's Schengen Zone.[9] The US state of Hawaiʻi requires all visitors, even those on domestic flights, to fill out a card which is sent to the state's department of agriculture.[10]

The requirement to produce an arrival card is usually in addition to a requirement to produce a passport or other travel document, to obtain a visa, and sometimes complete a customs declaration.

Information on the card itself

The information requested varies by country. Typically the information requested on the arrival card includes:

-   Full name
-   Nationality
-   Date of birth
-   Passport number, place of issuance and expiration date
-   Flight number or name of aircraft, ship or vehicle
-   Purpose of trip: vacation, education/study, visiting relatives/families, business, diplomatic
-   Duration of stay
-   Destination (next stop of disembarkation)
-   Address in country
-   Information on items being bought into the country which may be of interest to customs and quarantine authorities

Travellers are generally required to sign, date, and declare the information is true, correct, and complete.

United Kingdom

Non-EEA citizens were formerly required to complete a landing card on entry to the United Kingdom. The traveller was required to present the completed form at the Border Force desk at the point of entry. The form was usually supplied by the airline, train or ferry company.[11]

In the UK, the landing card system was governed by the Immigration Act 1971, schedule 2 paragraph 5, which states;[12]

[13][14][15]

In August 2017, the UK Home Office announced that landing cards will be completely scrapped as part of digital border transformation and modernisation. It was expected this change would come into effect by the autumn.[16] Landing cards were abolished for all passengers effective 20 May 2019.[17]

Notably absent from the landing card was information on the purpose of the trip, destination, or any items brought into the country. Additional information requested from travellers was their occupation and the port of their last departure.[18][19][20]

[Border Force officers staff the UK border at London Heathrow Airport's Terminal 5, where landing cards were turned in]

[1] Passenger Cards. _Department of Immigration and Citizenship_. Australian Government.

[2] cbp.gov, What to Declare

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[4] NZIS431 - New Zealand Passenger Departure Card . _Statistics New Zealand_.

[5] NZIS431 - New Zealand Passenger Departure Card. _Statistics New Zealand_.

[6] Malaysia no longer require immigration cards

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[8] cbp.gov, US Citizens

[9] per Article 21 of the Schengen Borders Code (OJ L 105, 13 April 2006, p. 1).

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[11] UK, gov.uk, Entering the UK

[12] International scholarship guide, 7 Things to do before your planes lands and once you alight at a UK International Airport

[13] Children & Immigration By Jeremy Rosenblatt, Ian Lewis, page 88

[14] Immigration Law Handbook, 2013, By Margaret Phelan, James Gillespie, page 50

[15] parliament.uk, Nationality, Immigration and Asylum Bill, 172.6

[16] Outdated landing cards to be withdrawn as part of digital border transformation

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[18] UK Landing Card, pic

[19] UK Landing Card, pic

[20] go2london.co.uk, Do you need a Visa to go to London?

title: Arrival card

question: What does the text say about the use of arrival cards in the United States?

answer: U.S. Customs and Border Protection Form 6059B is used in many countries to obtain information about incoming passengers. The form is known as an arrival card or an incoming passenger card. Some countries such as Singapore and Thailand attach a departure card to the arrival card, which is retained in the alien's passport until their eventual departure. The arrival card can also be combined with a customs declaration, which some countries require incoming passengers to fill out separately. Malaysia, on the other hand, does not require an arrival or departure card.

critique: The answer should mention that the procedure of compiling information from immigration cards is no longer required by United States authorities following the introduction of the biometric recording system by the United States Customs and Border Protection.

critique: The responses discuss the procedures followed in other countries. It is irrelevant to mention them.

critique: The second and third sentences are not relevant to the question.

critique: The last two sentences are irrelevant to the question.

critique: The answer should mention that the United States no longer requires an arrival card.

critique: The answer should mention that the U.S. no longer requires an arrival card.

question: What does the text say about the abolishment of landing cards in the UK?

answer:
In the UK, non-EEA citizens were formerly required to complete a landing card on entry to the UK. The travellers were required to present a completed form at the Border Force desk upon entry. The form was usually supplied by the airline, train, or ferry companies.

In August 2017, the UK Home Office announced that the landing cards would be scrapped as part of digital border transformations. It was expected that this change would come into effect by the autumn. Landing cards were abolished for all passengers effective 20 May 2019.

critique: The text does not mention that the form was supplied by the airline, train, or ferry companies.

critique: The response misses to mention that the information on the card was not included in the new digital border system.

critique: The answer should mention that the landing cards were abolished for all passengers.

critique: The answer omits the reason for the abolishment of the landing cards.

critique: The answer should mention that the information on the landing card was not included in the new form.

critique: The date of the change should be mentioned.

critique: Include information about why it was abolished

critique: The answer should mention that the information on the card was omitted.


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[Caporn says the <i>Avengers</i> tattoo his girlfriend paid for on his 27th birthday is the best present he ever received.]

Caporn says the _Avengers_ tattoo his girlfriend paid for on his 27th birthday is the best present he ever received.Credit:Twitter @capey

Mr Caporn began collecting 20 years ago, buying up to 30 comic books each week, and has now built up a collection of more than 10,000.

"I actually worked out I've been reading comic books for about 20 years, and that's continually buying them every week," he said.

"I have a whole office full of toys and books and pieces and a whole bedroom back at my parents place.

"Anytime anyone comes to visit they come have a look at my geek den."

[Luke Caporn calls his room of collectables his "geek den".]

Luke Caporn calls his room of collectables his "geek den".Credit:Twitter @capey

Mr Caporn plans to one day open his own store and once travelled interstate to dine with US comic book creator "god", Stan Lee.

"He was going to Melbourne to Oz Comic-Con and I booked flights and tickets immediately and fished out a bit of money," he said.

[Caporn has previously commissioned Mark Brooks (Amazing Spider-Man, Ultimate X-Men) to create a piece of artwork for him.]

Caporn has previously commissioned Mark Brooks (Amazing Spider-Man, Ultimate X-Men) to create a piece of artwork for him.Credit:Twitter @capey

"The dinner cost about $250 but he's like 90 so I knew it was the only chance in my lifetime to meet him.

"He's pretty much a god."

[Fans will pay between $27.50 and $780 for a ticket to Supanova.]

Fans will pay between $27.50 and $780 for a ticket to Supanova.Credit:Twitter @capey

The 28-year-old has even been recognised at overseas conventions for the _Avengers_ tattoo he has inked on his wrist.

"I've travelled to Singapore for a convention before...they'd seen me online so I was getting recognised," he said.

"It's kind of like wearing my 'geekdom' on my sleeve.

"Since the [_Avengers_] film came out, people love it."

Attending conventions allows him to connect with people who share his interests.

"The culture is great - people with your same interests and people in costumes," he said.

"All different fans and we all get along.

"In my general life I don't have too many friends who share those interests."

Cultural studies lecturer Jon Stratton says fantasy and sci-fi are unique genres because they create spaces for fans to escape into.

"Sci-fi creates alternative worlds and that fascinates people," he said.

"It means you get some people who want to expand on that world and others who want to live in that world rather than this one.

"People are fascinated by the kinds of aliens that are created and the potential possibilities with different kinds of alien life."

Fans collect autographs and photos of the genres' celebrities because it gave them a special claim to share that experience with others, the Curtin University lecturer says.

"An autograph is something that's specific to a particular individual," he said.

"It's something that you can show to people to say 'I met this person'.

"A lot of this goes back to the idea of celebrity.

"If you've done film or television, because it's a mass medium and so many people can see you, there's that sense that you become something special and people think that you're different."

Supanova VIP tickets sell for up to $780 and when Arnold Schwarzenegger visited Perth, fans paid $10,000 for a spot at his private dinner.

"It tells you something about the extraordinary celebrity," Professor Stratton said.

"Arnold Schwarzenegger started off as an amazing bodybuilder then he made a number of films, many of which are still very highly regarded.

"It's a remarkable career and talk about an immigrant success story in the United States."

Professor Stratton said while $10,000 to meet 'Arnie' - or even $80 to meet Carrie Fisher - might seem over the top to some people, the value of tickets, signatures and photos was whatever fans were willing to pay to get their piece of history.

"What you have with Carrie Fisher is that history of being Princess Leia, a very charismatic character - one of the characters that people most remember from Star Wars," he said.

"People are prepared to pay that much money to be close to them and get their autograph so in that sense it's clearly not too much money."

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question: What does the text say about Caporn's tattoo?

answer: Caporn has an Avengers tattoo on his wrist. He got it for his 27th birthday. He says it's the best present he ever received. He has been recognized for it at overseas conventions.

critique: The answer should mention that the tattoo was paid for by his girlfriend.

question: What does the text say about Arnold Schwarzenegger?

answer: Arnold Schwarzenegger was a bodybuilder and then made many films that are highly regarded. He visited Perth once and had a private dinner with fans. The dinner was $80 and a private dinner with Carrie Fisher was $10,000.

question: Summarize why tickets to meet celebrities at private dinners and attend events are very expensive.

answer: Tickets to meet celebrities at private dinners and attend events are very expensive due to their celebrity status. The public has a fascination with celebrities, and fans are willing to pay a lot to have the opportunity to have a private dinner with them.

critique: The answer should mention the value of autographs and photos.

critique: "The public has a fascination with celebrities, and fans are willing to pay a lot to have the opportunity to have a private dinner with them." - this is incorrect because the article says nothing about fans paying a lot for private dinners with celebrities.

critique: The answer doesn't mention the celebrity's role in the event.

critique: It is more accurate to simply state that tickets to private dinners frequently exceed $1,000 in certain events.

critique: The answer does not mention Arnold Schwarzenegger.

critique: The answer should mention the rarity of the event.

question: What does the text say about Comic-Con in the United States?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the text doesn't mention Comic-Con in the United States.


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On the other side of our Human World, there was a Monster World.

There was a young monster named Davi.  Davi was a lonely boy.  He had seven brothers, but he always stayed home alone.

Davi cried everyday.  He wanted to make friends.

Davi went to talk to his grandfather, who was the guard of the gate which connects Human World and Monster World.

Davi asked his grandfather, "I want to go to Human World.  I don't have any friends here.  Maybe I can make friends over there."

Gradfather said "No, it's too dangerous.  No one in Human World likes Monsters.  You won't make any friends there."

But Davi went "Nobody in Monster World likes me anyway.  I want to at least try making friends in Human World!"

Grandfather decided to allow Davi 3 days in Human World, and gave Davi 3 gold coins, and told him "These coins may help you when you are in trouble."

Davi thanked his grandfather, and went through the gate.

Davi walked through the dark...

Davi landed on the street.  He was amazed at the sun, the sky, the tall trees, and the houses!

Davi saw a college dormitory in which college girls were petting a cat.

Davi sneaked into the dormitory and talked to the cat. "Mr!" said Davi.  "How can I make friends with humans?"

" Meow! " answered Mr. Cat.  "I am not going to tell you because you are a Monster.  We don't like monsters.  But I see you have three gold coins in your pocket.  If you give me one coin, I'll answer your question."

Davi gave him one gold coin.  Then Mr. Cat went "Ok!  All I do is mew and purr at people's feet."

Davi said "Thank you, Mr. Cat!"

Davi approached the college girls, who were busy chattering with each other, and purred and mewed at their feet.  The college girls turned around, and...

"AAARRRGGGHHH!!!  Monster!!!"  The college girls screamed in horror, and ran out of the building!

Davi was left alone in the dormitory.  He walked out on the street, and he cried and cried and cried all night long.

On the second day, Davi saw two young boys playing with a dog in a house.

Davi sneaked into the house, and talked to the Dog. "Mr!" said Davi.  "How can I make friends with Humans?"

" Arf!" answers Mr. Dog.  "I am not going to tell you because you are a monster.  We don't monsters.  But I see you have two gold coins in your pocket.  If you give me one coin, I'll be happy to answer your question."

So Davi gave him one coin.  Then Mr. Dog went "Okay!  All I do is bow-wow, and lick people's faces."  "Thank you, Mr. Dog!" said Davi.

Davi approached the two young boys, and suddenly licked their faces and BOW-WOWED!!

"AAARRRGGGHHH!!! MONSTER!!"  cried the two young boys.  They screamed in horror and ran out of the building!

Davi was left alone in the house.  He walked out on the street, and he cried and cried and cried all night long.

On the third day, Davi saw a huge house in which an old blind lady was feeding a small bird in a cage.

Davi sneaked into the house, and talked to the bird. "Mrs!" said Davi.  "How can I make friends with humans?"

"Chirp!" answered Mrs. Bird.  "I am not going to tell you because you are a Monster.  We don't Monsters.  But I see you have one gold coin in your pocket.  If you give me the coin, I'll be happy to answer your question."

So Davi gave her his last gold coin.  Then Mrs. Bird says "Okay!  All I do is chirp and sing a song!"

Davi started singing a song.  Then...

"Where does this come from?" the old blind lady approached Davi.  Davi was so happy.  "This is the most beautiful song I have ever heard,"said Old Blind Lady.

Then she touched Davi's face.  "Who are you? What is this?  Could this be a... AAARRRGGGHHH!!! Monster!!!!"  The Old Blind Lady screamed in horror, and fainted dead!

Davi was left alone once again.  He walked out on the street, and he cried and cried and cried all night long.

Davi went back to the gate.  He was very sad.  The trees, the sun, the sky didn't amaze Davi anymore.

Davi met his grandfather at the gate.  Grandfather went "Why are you crying?"  Then Davi answered "I tried really hard to make friends with humans, and asked Mr. Cat, Mr. Dog and Mrs. Bird for advise, and I followed their good advice, but nobody liked
 me.  Nobody cared about me anywhere.  I'll be alone for the rest of my life.  Nobody likes me!"

Then grandfather answered "It takes so much courage just to go to Human World.  And you were on your own Davi.  You are the most courageous Monster I have ever seen.  Everytime you cried, you learned to be stronger.  You don't need anyone else."

Davi listened to his grandfather.  "Now go home, Davi," said grandfather.

Davi walked back to his house, and opened the door, then...

Davi's seven brothers rushed to Davi, cheering "We've heard you were in Human World by yourself?!" "I wish I can be like you!"  "You are so brave!"

Davi finally smiled.  From that day on, Davi played with his brothers everyday, and lived happily ever after.

(Copyright @ myself)

title: An original children's story about a monster who tries to make friends with people

question: Summarize the main conflict in the story.

answer: Davi, the main character of the story, is a monster who wants to find friends. His grandfather is a monster who disapproves of this idea and warns him of the dangers of venturing into the human world. Davi, despite his grandfather's warnings, runs away from home and ventures into the human world. Once there, he asks various people how to become friends with humans. When the creatures realize he is a monster, they run in fear. However, Davi doesn't give up. He finally decides to just return to the monster world and play with his brothers every day.

critique: The response does not go into detail about the conflict.

critique: The answer should mention that Davi's grandfather eventually changes his mind and allows Davi to go to the human world.

critique: The answer omits that Davi's grandfather allows him to go to the human world and gives him three gold coins to help him in case he gets in trouble.

critique: Adding the missing end of the story would be helpful

text: It is incorrect that Davi asks various people about how to become friends with humans, he asks various animals about it.

category: accuracy

question: Summarize how the conflict gets resolved.

answer: Davi feels lonely because he has seven brothers but stays at home alone. He wants to make friends. He goes to the Human World, but people there are afraid of him. His grandfather lets him come back home, and his brothers envy him for his bravery.

critique: The answer should mention that his grandfather tells him he doesn't need anyone, and his brothers become his friends.

critique: It's omitted that Davi's grandfather tells him he's the bravest monster he's ever seen, and Davi's brothers play with him from then on.

critique: There is no evidence in the passage to suggest this

critique: The answer should mention that Davi's grandfather tells him he doesn't need anyone else.

critique: It is omitted that Davi's grandfather tells him he doesn't need anyone else.

question: What are some other tactics Davi's grandfather might have suggested before he allowed Davi to try out the human world?

answer: Davi's grandfather might have asked him why he wanted to go the human world. If there was a reason for Davi to want to go to the human world, the grandfather might have been able to point out the problems with Davi trying to become friends with humans.

critique: The answer is not accurate. It is not stated that the grandfather asked Davi why he wanted to go to the human world.

critique: The answer should mention that the grandfather could have given him some advice on how to make friends with humans.

question: Summarize the thing that remains the same about Davi throughout the story, and the thing that changes.

answer: The only thing that remains the same about Davi throughout the story is his love for adventure. The story shows that he's adventurous enough to take a risk by going to the Human World by himself, despite his grandfather's advice to the contrary. What changes is that Davi finds the courage to remain upbeat despite the fact that he's encountered three instances of rejection.

critique: "The only thing that remains the same about Davi throughout the story is his love for adventure. The story shows that he's adventurous enough to take a risk by going to the Human World by himself, despite his grandfather's advice to the contrary." - this is incorrect. Davi's bravery was never in question. He was always considered a brave monster. This should be omitted.


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STANFORD SHEROCK KEGLAR (born July 4, 1985) is an American football linebacker who is currently a free agent. He was drafted by the Tennessee Titans in the fourth round of the 2008 NFL Draft. He played college football at Purdue.

Early years

Stanford Sherock Keglar was born on July 4, 1985 in Indianapolis, Indiana.[1] Playing at Pike High School in Indianapolis, Indiana, he was coached by former Purdue defensive back Ken Coudret.[2] As a junior, he had 72 tackles, four sacks, four fumble recoveries and one interception.[3] During his senior season, Keglar totaled 83 tackles, five sacks, two forced fumbles, two fumble recoveries and one interception.[4] After the season, he was named honorable mention All-State, First-Team All County and First Team All-Conference.[5] He was ranked as the eighth best college football prospect in Indiana and the 26th best linebacker by _Rivals.com_.[6] During his high school years he also participated in track & field as well as swimming and was sectional winner in the 50 freestyle.[7]

College career

2003

Keglar played in only one game as a freshman at Purdue before suffering a high ankle sprain and missing the rest of the season.[8]

2004

During his sophomore year, he started all 12 games.[9] Keglar recorded 61 tackles, three pass breakups, and one forced fumble.[10] Against Notre Dame he had a career high seven tackles.[11]

2005

As a junior, Keglar appeared in 10 games, starting six.[12] He ranked fourth on the team with 50 tackles and added one sack and a pass breakup.[13] On September 17 against Arizona he equaled his career high with seven tackles.[14]

2006

Appearing in all 14 games and starting 10 as a senior at Purdue, Keglar had 69 tackles, five pass breakups, one interception, one forced fumble and a fumble recovery.[15] Keglar broke his career high in tackles with 10 against Ball State.[16] He had a team high nine tackles in the Champs Sports Bowl against Maryland.[17]

Professional career

Tennessee Titans

Keglar was drafted by the Tennessee Titans in the fourth round of the 2008 NFL Draft. He was signed on July 15, 2008.[18] In 13 games as a rookie he totaled 12 tackles.[19] On September 5, 2010, Keglar was waived by Tennessee.

Houston Texans

Keglar signed with the Houston Texans on October 25, 2010. He was cut on September 3, 2011.

Minnesota Vikings

Keglar was signed by the Vikings on May 29, 2013. He was cut on June 27, 2013.

Vikings re-signed Keglar again on August 6, 2013 after cutting Nathan Williams.[20] Keglar was again released by the Vikings on August 26, 2013 (along with 12 others) to get to a 75-man roster.[21]

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title: Stanford Keglar

question: Summarize possible negative moments in Keglar's career.

answer: Keglar played in only one game as a freshman at Purdue before suffering a high ankle sprain and missing the rest of the season. He was waived by the Tennessee Titans in 2010. He was cut by the Houston Texans in 2011. He was cut by the Minnesota Vikings in 2013.

critique: The answer should mention that he was signed and waived by the Vikings twice.

critique: The answer should mention that he was waived again in 2013.

critique: The answer should mention that he was cut from the Vikings twice.

question: Summarize Keglar's high school years.

answer: Keglar played football at Pike High School in Indianapolis, Indiana. He was coached by former Purdue defensive back Ken Coudret. As a junior, he had 72 tackles, four sacks, four fumble recoveries, and one interception. During his senior season, he had 83 tackles, five sacks, two forced fumbles, two fumble recoveries, and one interception. After the season, he was named honorable mention All-State, First-Team All County, and First Team All-Conference. He was ranked as the eighth best college football prospect in Indiana and the 26th best linebacker by Rivals.com. During his high school years, he also participated in track & field and swimming.

critique: The answer should mention that he was ranked as the eighth best college football prospect in Indiana and the 26th best linebacker by Rivals.com.

question: Summarize Keglar's best football season in college.

answer: Keglar's best football season in college was his senior year. He appeared in all 14 games and started 10. He had 69 tackles, five pass breakups, one interception, one forced fumble, and a fumble recovery. He broke his career high in tackles with 10 against Ball State. He had a team high nine tackles in the Champs Sports Bowl against Maryland.

critique: The answer should mention that he was named honorable mention All-State, First-Team All County, and First Team All-Conference.

critique: The answer can be reduced down to "his senior year" and "69 tackles, five pass breakups, one interception, one forced fumble, and a fumble recovery"

critique: Does not mention that he was named honorable mention All-State, First-Team All County, and First Team All-Conference.

question: What does the text say about Keglar's personal life?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the text does not mention anything about his personal life.


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BRAIN CIRCULATION is the circular movement of skilled labour across nations.

Brain circulation differs from brain drain which describes skilled labour from certain countries emigrating to other countries in search of better opportunities. In India one witnessed large-scale emigration of engineers from its premier engineering institutes ) in the sixties, seventies and eighties.

The late nineties and the early years of the 21st century however saw large numbers of these emigrants returning to India as prospects in India improved markedly, brought on by important economic reforms initiated in the early nineties.

Brain circulation vs. brain drain

There has been debate whether outflow of high skilled labor mobility should be regarded positively or negatively. The core theoretical framework for studying human capital flows dates back to at least John Hicks (1932), who noted that “differences in net economic advantages, chiefly differences in wages, are the main causes of migration”. Classic literature back in 1950s~1980s also follows Hicks’ work, and has come to a consensus on receiving countries having benefits; however, sending countries lose human capital, and thus have potential negative effects of the skilled emigration (Bhagwati and Hamada, 1974).

Since the 1990s, a growing literature discusses the positive effect of high-skilled labor outflow, and argues that under certain circumstances, the brain drain may ultimately prove beneficial to the source country, and to do this while accounting for the various fiscal and technological externalities that were at the heart of the pessimistic models of the 1970s. Outflow of high-skilled labor can form a diaspora abroad, which promotes trade between the sending countries and countries that have the diaspora (Rauch and Trindale, 2002).

Some high skilled workers come back to their home countries, even though they once leave their home countries for various reasons such as political instability and wage gap. They still have connections with home countries through their extended families and friends, which can be an incentive for them to return home. Wahba (2014) points out that most migrants ponder and plan their move back home throughout their migration experience. There are growing evidences that show some immigrants decided to come back and start their new life in home countries. For example, 20 to 50% of immigrants return home or relocate to a different country within five years of their arrival (OECD, 2008). Also, almost one-third of the migrants who came to the U.S. between 1908 and 1957 returned to their home countries (Jasso and Rosenzweig, 1982). Moreover, nearly one-quarter of male migrants who came to Canada in 1996 left within five years (Aydemir and Robinson, 2008).

It is true that some high-skilled workers return to home countries, not just moving out abroad. Then, why do they come back? First, they return home because they cannot adopt themselves to a new environment abroad. If they have trouble finding a job or making social connections, they might consider returning home. Dustmann and Görlach (2016) point out that if migrants struggle to assimilate or learn the language, this can contribute to their desire to return home.

Second, they return home because home countries have economic opportunities. One of the most critical reasons of high skilled outflow is wage gap between home countries and host countries. Many highly educated people go abroad to find a better job with higher salary. If home countries have a better job environment with reasonable salary, they are more likely to return home. Whether countries focus on tertiary industry or not can also be an important sign for high skilled labor abroad to return home. If countries have more budget for R&D and focus on a knowledge-based economy, workers would expect that they are more likely to get a suitable job where they can make use of their experiences abroad and contribute. Shin and Moon (2018) mentioned that some migrants abroad were interested in engaging their home countries but did not want to permanently return. Thus, it is important for governments to supplement return migration support policies.

Third, they return home because home countries offer benefits for returning from the diaspora abroad. Countries need many high skilled workers to stimulate their economic development. Thus, some countries offer benefits to highly educated people such as tax exemption, housing, and legal benefits.

Returning migrants can contribute to their home countries in various fields. First, return migration improves financial capital, entrepreneurship and social networks. They return home with a significant amount of financial capital, and a large portion of these savings is generally invested in housing and new businesses. Also, return migration has social networks around the world, which strengthens social networks within home countries and across the world (Adda et al., 2014). When migrants return home, they enhance social networks in several key ways. They build ties with other returnees and local non-migrants in job findings. They can also connect with diaspora members who remain overseas. These connections expand valuable social networks as well as professional ones.

Second, return migrants improve human capital and wage increases. The use of skills and knowledge acquired abroad can stimulate development and produce higher earnings at home. They also can show the importance of education through their successful career with higher education, which can increase people's expectations toward education.

Third, return migrations improve social norms and democracy. Many migrations from developing countries go to developed countries, where most countries have higher social norms with a democratic political system. Migrants are exposed to a host country's institutions, legal systems and other cultural norms. Batista and Vicente (2011) note that international migration can increase demand for improved governance. Countries can have more transparent political and economic systems through return migration.

Outflow of high-skilled labor has been considered as brain circulation, and they can potentially contribute to the home countries by bringing back their work experiences abroad.

title: Brain circulation

question: Detail the ways in which brain circulation helps societies.

answer: Brain circulation helps societies by bringing back the work experiences of the migrants. This helps the societies by improving financial capital, entrepreneurship, and social networks. It also helps by improving human capital and wage increases. It also helps by improving social norms and democracy.

critique: It's omitted that brain circulation helps societies by bringing back the work experiences of the migrants.

critique: The answer should mention the ways in which brain circulation helps societies.

critique: It doesn't help with government transparency.

critique: The answer omits the ways in which brain circulation helps societies.

critique: The answer should mention the ways in which the return of high-skilled labor can help the societies.


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    Red Ribbon

    	Each blink is more difficult and it takes me just a bit more effort to open my eyes than it did the last time. The     cold of my bathtub is comforting. I lean back, take a deep breath and slowly exhale. My mind hasn't stopped     racing, showing me images from my childhood, from my adolescence, from high school, from college.
	At four years old, I ran away from a camping trip to try to catch up to my parents on a hiking trail. I didn't know which direction they had gone, so I just followed the river. Ten minutes later, I was still alone and it started to sink in. No one is going to take care of me but myself. “#%!^, that's a scary thought. How will I be able to eat? I don't know how to do anything...” I wandered for what felt like forever, never straying from the security of the path I was on. Ah, the path.
	I snapped back to the present. That path. Nearly thirty years later and I realized I was jealous of that path. It had a direction, it knew where it was going. The only surprises on that path came from off the trail. Was this the right way to live my life? Is this how I would find happiness? Should I become a singularly focused individual, striving only for one goal, ignoring anything outside of that? This path is more soulful than I would have imagined a dirt road could be.
	I blink again. My eyelids feel sticky. I'm in my kitchen and I'm nine years old. Our kitchen is being remodeled and the floor is missing. I can see the dirt, spiderwebs, the century of unuse under the house. There is no rot, there is no termite damage, there is no foundation. Our house sits directly on the dirt hillside, raised up just enough to allow air to flow underneath. The house feels sturdy but there is nothing holding it in place, it could slide down the hill at any moment. Who cares? What does this mean?
	The hole in the floor of the kitchen is all I can think about when I open my eyes again. This house has lasted for more than 100 years. All without any sort of foundation, in earthquake country. It has been shaken and beaten more then I ever could be. It refuses to collapse but instead welcomes new people and wraps them in its love. This house is like a grandmother nearing senility; a shaky foundation, but a strong outward presence. A welcoming hug every time you enter through the front door. Is this how I should live? Wandering the earth, rootless, searching for a place to make a stand and show my love for my fellow man? I tried that in college, it didn't work. Free love and no foundation made me completely insecure. At any moment I could be cast aside and would have nothing to fall back on.
	My eyes lose focus as I follow the wall down from the ceiling to the bathtub, finally coming to rest on the floor of the bathtub. The rouge river winds down hands to my knees and finally pools at my heels until there is enough to continue its one-way journey. The thin thread heads straight into the darkness at the end of the tub, where it drips nosily into the drain.
	I blink twice. The second blink takes me away again. It's my Sophomore year of high school and I'm in love for the first time. Her name was Carrie, she was blonde with blue eyes. She was the co-captain of the JV Cheer squad and she always smelled like a freshly picked peony. We went on our first date together when I asked her to the Winter Formal. When I picked her up, I had to sit through “the talk” from her father while I waited for her to put her finishing touches on. After the dance, we went to an after party thrown by one of the Seniors. I didn't drink at all (it was part of “the talk”) but she did and by the time I got her back to her house, the alcohol was in full effect. We made out for half an hour. That 30 minutes was all it took, I knew I was in love. Our relationship lasted for the rest of the year but it didn't make it past the Summer she spent working on her uncle's ranch in Wyoming. I got two reasons out of her, and I've never known which one was more true. She said, “You're just too....nice” and “Cowboys.” My soul crushed, I spent the next two months sad and pitiful. First love, first loss, first time the nice guy finished dead last.
	My eyelids are heavy, but I open them and sigh. I'm back in the bathtub. I'm not an adolescent any more. I sigh again, this time in relief. The bathtub isn't so cold anymore, it has stolen my body heat giving only white porcelain in return. I brush my hand against the side of the tub, leaving irregular streaks as I move my fingers and paint with my essence. I see bits of Van Gogh and Cezanne in the chaotic crimson my fingers trail behind. I shut my eyes and am transported to my friends dorm in college. Jill is seated on her bed with Starry Night peaking at me over her right shoulder. There are two other friends in here, but I can't see their faces or remember their names. We have been discussing which super power we would want to have and why for the last three hours. I have held to my contention that being able to stop time would make one unstoppable while heavily debating flight and superspeed. We finally stop debating at 2am and I go home to sleep. In the morning, I hear from friends in the dorms near Jill. They are all asking me what I was talking about last night, apparently they could hear my laugh from the next dorm over. I tell them. They laugh more. I feel ashamed that my laugh has made me recognizable from hundreds of feet away. I am embarrassed by our conversation. I make a mental note, which I will immediately forget, to tone down my laugh.
	As I open my eyes from this memory, I realize the truth. I have spent most of my life running from my emotions. They crippled me time and again. My brain doesn't see it that way however, it relishes the emotions, the differences, the change, the unique. The problem is that I don't. My brain is pleading with me in the only way it knows how. It is pleading for me to reverse this process. It is imploring me to lift myself up, to stand up again. I finally relent and lift my heavy hands, attached to heavy arms, to the edge of the tub. I set my feet flat against the floor of the tub, toes pushing against the side so I don't slip in the pooled and partially coagulated blood. I see my phone, it is across the room. It is now my only chance for survival. I strain my muscles to stand.

My eyes close.

title: Red Ribbon [1200 words] (first post here, feedback welcome, please comment)

question: What does the story say about the narrator's age?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should state that the narrator's age isn't mentioned.

critique: The response misses to answer the instruction in the task.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator is implied to be in their thirties.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator is implied to be at least 30 years old.

question: What does the story say about its timeline?

answer: The narrator is in his early 40s. The events are spread out over a period of about 20 years. The narrator has a memory of his time in college.

critique: The narrator spent their last years in school and didn't start their working career until after 2005, so it more likely that the story's events are spread out over 20-30 years instead of a minimum of 20 years as written in the answer.

critique: The answer does not mention the narrator's memories from his childhood and adolescence.

critique: The narrator is not in his 40s-he is in his 20s or 30s.

critique: The story does not state the narrator's age.

critique: The narrator is not in his early 40s. The events are not spread out over a period of about 20 years. The narrator has a memory of his time in high school.

question: What does the story say about the narrator and his first love?

answer: The narrator had his first love in high school. Her name was Carrie, she was the co-captain of the JV cheer squad, and she always smelled like a freshly picked peony. They went on their first date to the Winter Formal, and they made out for half an hour. Carrie broke up with him after the Summer she spent working on her uncle's ranch in Wyoming. She said he was too nice and that she was into cowboys.

critique: The response should include that the narrator was devastated by the break-up.

question: What does the story say about happiness?

answer: No answer

critique: The story does say something about happiness.

critique: The answer should mention the narrator's realization that he has been running from his emotions.

critique: Add "The narrator is running away from her emotions, which cripples her"


text:
Since being founded in 1975, the EUROPEAN NUCLEAR SOCIETY (ENS) has grown to become the largest society in Europe for science, engineering and research in support of the nuclear industry.[1] ENS’s membership consists of national nuclear societies from 22 European countries, plus Israel. Within the membership there are also stakeholder representatives for nuclear technology and research businesses, with around 60 corporate members.[2] ENS exists to promote the advancement of peaceful uses of nuclear energy on an international level, encouraging networking between countries and facilitating meetings to support global communication on scientific and technical affairs. ENS also supports education and training in engineering, promotes international standardisation in the nuclear industry, coordinates the activities of the member organisations and develops the expertise and capability needed for the future of the industry.[3] One of ENS’s activities is organising conferences and workshops, providing a platform for international forums to exchange knowledge, experience, ideas and scientific developments.[4]

The current president of the European Nuclear Society is Noël Camarcat.[5]

The ENS is member of the International Nuclear Societies Council (INSC).

ENS Young Generation Network (YGN)

The ENS Young Generation Network (YGN) has been active across the society’s member countries since 1995 when ENS supported a proposal from Jan Runermark, the then President-elect of ENS, to spread the Young Generation Network (YGN) to all its member countries.[6] Five objectives ensure that YGN members are working towards a common goal, these are:

-   Attracting more young people: Recruiting and educating young people to be skilled members of the nuclear industry
-   Training new leaders: Exchanging knowledge between generations
-   Thinking nationally: Participation of young people in the national nuclear societies
-   Thinking internationally: Bringing together all national YGNs at European level
-   Opening up nuclear conferences: Ensuring events are relevant and topical for young people to attend.[7][8]

YGN membership is available to anybody working in the nuclear industry, as well as fields of nuclear academia and research.

European Nuclear Young Generation Forum (ENYGF)

The European Nuclear Young Generation Forum (ENYGF) is a biennial international event, held since 2005 by the Young Generation Network (YGN) as part of the European Nuclear Society.[9] The forum alternates with the International Youth Nuclear Congress (IYNC) and is held in a different location in Europe each time.

The aim of the event is to provide a platform for learning and networking for young professionals in all areas of nuclear application. It provides a chance to enhance international communication as well as sharing technical advances and knowledge, learning from experience and discussing best practice as well as considering social and political aspects of the nuclear industry.[10]

The forum involves:

-   Formal lectures and presentations
-   Workshops - which have previously included Women in Nuclear (WiN)[11]
-   Technical tours
-   Keynote speakers
-   Social and cultural events

Each forum has a number of central focuses, around which the speakers, lectures, presentations and workshops are based. In 2011, the forum in Prague focused on the topics of nuclear safety and severe accidents, education and training, new build projects and ITER and fusion.[12] At the 2015 forum in Paris the main focus points were nuclear efficiency and nuclear and the environment.

Previous ENYGF events

Following the success of IYNC conferences which began in the year 2000, the ENS-YGN decided to create the ENYGF 2005 and host the inaugural event in the city Zagreb, Croatia. Following this, the ENS-YGN elected cities to host the event every two years, the host locations to date have been:

-   ENYGF 2007, Amsterdam, Netherlands[13]
-   ENYGF 2009, Córdoba, Spain[14]
-   ENYGF 2011, Prague, Czech Republic[15]
-   ENYGF 2013, Stockholm, Sweden. With 300 participants where the previous record was 150[16]
-   ENYGF 2015, Paris, France[17]

The events are organized by an executive committee from the selected country. This executive committee can acquire assistance from delegates of other countries who chose to collaborate. All the committee members have a common goal which is to further the ENS-YGN mission and help to create a global community of nuclear professionals.

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title: European Nuclear Society

question: What does the article say about the European Nuclear Society's (ENS) aims?

answer: The ENS exists to promote the advancement of peaceful uses of nuclear energy on an international level, encouraging networking between countries and facilitating meetings to support global communication on scientific and technical affairs. ENS also supports education and training in engineering, promotes international standardisation in the nuclear industry, coordinates the activities of the member organisations and develops the expertise and capability needed for the future of the industry.

critique: "ENS also supports education and training in engineering, promotes international standardisation in the nuclear industry, coordinates the activities of the member organisations and develops the expertise and capability needed for the future of the industry." - this is too long and should be omitted.

critique: The answer should mention the ENS's Young Generation Network.

question: What does the article say about ENS events?

answer: The European Nuclear Society (ENS) is a society for science, engineering and research in support of the nuclear industry. The ENS has grown to become the largest society in Europe for science, engineering and research in support of the nuclear industry. The ENS has 22 member countries, plus Israel. It has 60 corporate members. It is a member of the International Nuclear Societies Council. The ENS has several events, including the European Nuclear Young Generation Forum, which is a biennial international event. The ENYGF is held in a different location in Europe each time. It has several focuses, such as nuclear safety, education and training, new build projects, and ITER and fusion. It is organized by an executive committee from the selected country.

critique: The first two sentences are unnecessary and should be removed.

critique: The answer is somewhat irrelevant to the question.

critique: The first two sentences are irrelevant to the question.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

question: What does the article say about the Fukushima disaster?

answer: No answer

critique: The article does not mention the Fukushima disaster.

critique: The answer should mention that the Fukushima disaster is not mentioned in the article.


text:
_BOOK OF BLOOD_ is a 2009 British erotic horror film directed by John Harrison and starring Jonas Armstrong, Sophie Ward, and Doug Bradley. It is based on the framing stories “The Book of Blood” and “On Jerusalem Street (A Postscript)” from Clive Barker's _Books of Blood_.

Plot

A hooded, disfigured young man is eating at a diner, being watched by a stranger. The stranger is Wyburd (Clive Russell), who has been stalking the young man, Simon (Jonas Armstrong). Wyburd convinces Simon to join him in his truck, where Simon passes out and awakens strapped to a table. Wyburd offers him a choice: a slow death, or a quick and clean death by telling the story of the Book of Blood, a series of scars and inscriptions carved on Simon from head to toe. Opting for a clean death, Simon reveals his story.

A young girl is violently raped and beaten in her bed while her parents stand outside screaming her name. An unseen force rips her face off, killing her. Several months later, paranormal professor Mary Florescu (Sophie Ward) and her partner Reg Fuller (Paul Blair) investigate the house to unlock its mysteriously murderous past. Mary encounters Simon McNeal, a seemingly clairvoyant young man to whom she develops an attraction. Simon reluctantly signs on to assist, and the three of them move in. Reg spots a terrifying ghost and dies from a fall. Mary sees Simon is attacked twice by ghosts; the second time, the ghosts carve into Simon's flesh with nails and glass shards, and Mary understands: she is the key to opening the way for the ghosts; her powers were what awakened them. She swears to the ghosts that she will tell all of their stories. The ghosts heed her words and depart, allowing Simon to survive the ordeal.

Simon reveals to Wyburd that he was from then on cursed to be the book on which the dead write while Mary wrote books and made millions off of the stories portrayed on him. As she aged, he remained the same youthful appearance, only more scarred with new stories for her to write. He admitted he couldn't take it anymore, so he fled, hence the reason Wyburd was hired to remove his skin. Wyburd, unmoved, lives up to his end of the bargain and kills Simon quickly. After placing his skin neatly into a suitcase, he waits for his payment. Blood suddenly starts pouring from the case, slowly filling the building that Wyburd is trapped in, and he drowns. Mary arrives, and is unfazed by Wyburd's body. She opens the suitcase, pulling out Simon's intact skin and smiling, as she begins to read the stories still being written upon the flesh.

Cast

Production

Adapted and directed by John Harrison from one of Clive Barker's _Books of Blood_, the film shoot occurred in Scotland, including Dundas Castle and Edinburgh[1] through December 2007 and into early 2008.[2] Following exposure at the 2008 European Film Market, and the completion of the FX shoot in London [3] _Book of Blood_ premiered in North America premiere during the Montreal Fantasia film festival on 13 July 2009.[4] _Book of Blood_ is the seventh story to be adapted from Barker's collection, following _Rawhead Rex_ (filmed in 1986), _The Forbidden_ (filmed in 1992 as _Candyman_), _The Last Illusion_ (filmed in 1995 as _Lord of Illusions_), _The Body Politic_ (filmed in 1997 within _Quicksilver Highway_), and _The Midnight Meat Train_. During his appearance at Fangoria's Weekend of Horrors, he noted that the film would be followed by _Dread_, _Pig Blood Blues_, and then _Madonna_.[5]

Release

The film premiered on 7 March 2009 as part of the Hamburg Fantasy Filmfest Nights. It was released the week of 28 September 2009 in the UK.

[1] (2015) Filmed here - 2008 Book of Blood, John Harrison Film Edinburgh, Retrieved 17 February 2015

[2] _Book of Blood_ at FEARnet

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title: Book of Blood

question: What does the story (in the plot section) say about human agency over their own death?

answer: No answer

question: What are some themes running throughout the movie?

answer: Consumption of food, unwanted advances by strangers, and oppression seem to be some themes.

critique: The themes are not explicitly stated in the passage.

critique: The answer is not related to the question.

text: There is no mention of or allusion to consumption of food in the text.

question: What does the story say about revenge?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer says that there is no answer where as the story says that vengeance/revenge is provided to Simon by the ghost.

critique: The answer should mention that the story does not mention revenge.


text:
The cabin had a musty, unused smell to it. It had been a couple of years since anyone had been here, so he went around and opened up all the doors and windows and just let the wind carry out the emptiness while he swept and dusted. It wasn’t too long, though, before he heard a car door out front.
“Who could that be?” he thought. His wife and son weren’t due until tomorrow. Jenny and her family weren’t supposed to be there until the day after. Puzzled, he frowned to himself before going to check, but he stopped and smiled again as soon as he turned around. There, leaning against the doorpost, was Jenny, looking the same as she always did with her long red hair hanging down her back, blue eyes, and a gentle, soft smile on her lips.
“Hey,” he said quietly. She walked toward him and said, “Hey,” before giving him a hug. They parted and he shook his head, marveling at the fact that although it had been almost two years since they had seen each other, there was no unfamiliarity there, no sense of distance grown as often happens. “I thought you weren’t coming until tomorrow night,” he said. “I decided to come early to air the place out.” She looked around the cabin and smiled at him. “Looks like you beat me to it.”
The day finished with them cleaning out the cabin, top to bottom. As often happens when two old friends find themselves doing some menial chores together, they wound up spending most of the time laughing at each other. Old jokes, new jokes, stories about people they knew now, and tales about people they knew back in the day. Just… enjoying the company of a person they didn’t have to hide anything from and have no reason to impress. As the afternoon came and went, and the evening turned to dusk, they cracked open the beer he’d brought and sat down on the porch to watch the sun sink behind the trees. A quiet peace drifted over them in the stillness of an evening free of demand.
Night fell and they decided to go inside and light a lamp or two so they could spend the rest of the evening playing cards at the kitchen table, they way they used to. As they sat and played, a peaceful quiet lingered with them and they didn’t disturb it with unnecessary chatter. After all, why should two people who know each other more intimately than most married couples ever do need to speak to feel comfortable around each other? As they sat there in the comfortable quiet, his mind began to drift across his memories, and across to her, thinking about all the things they had shared over almost thirty years of friendship. Growing up together, grade school, her boyfriends, his girlfriends, the breakups and the weddings, all of it touched his mind as they played. He realized, with a small amount of surprise, that almost all of his happy memories were ones he shared with her.
There had never been a relationship between them, never any hint that things should be other than what they were, and though they both acknowledged that it was a bit of an oddity whenever other people pointed it out, they had never thought much of it on their own. He looked over at her, picking up a card from the table, her hair and face glowing in the soft, yellow lamplight, and he couldn’t help but think of the only time the idea had presented itself that there could be more to their friendship than simply being friends.
They had gone camping, just the two of them, after her college sweetheart had left her and she wanted to get away, just get away from everything and everyone that reminded her of him. So they went out to the woods and just let it all go. That night, he remembered they had just looked across the fire at each other, her face and hair glowing then so much like they were glowing now, and he had thought to himself that she was beautiful. Not beautiful the way he told other people she was beautiful, but beautiful to him, in a much more personal and intimate way than he had known. He had thought, then, that he might be in love with her, and as she raised her eyes to meet his, he had known that the thought he saw in her eyes, her beautiful blue eyes glowing in the firelight, was the same as his. But the moment passed without record, and soon enough their hearts had gone their separate ways again.
He realized it was his turn to play and looked over at her, at this beautiful, amazing woman he had somehow spent his whole life with, and found her looking at him. A moment passed between them that seemed to last far longer than a heartbeat before her eyes left his again, but that was all it took, just one moment, for both of them to realize. She reached for another card, distractedly, and as she reached for it, he reached for her, and gently, oh so gently, placed his hand on hers. She lifted her gaze to meet his once again, and this time there was no hiding the question in her eyes, the desperate longing needing an answer. A sad smile drew across his face and, heart breaking oh so gently, he shook his head, just a tiny motion back and forth. His hand left hers, and she drew her card.
They played into the night, still holding onto that quiet comfort, but he wondered now if his life would feel the same to him, now that it had been acknowledged. It seemed a lonely life, knowing that the woman you had married wasn’t the one you should have, that the one you loved wasn’t the one waiting at home for you.
They finished their game and said goodnight. He changed out of his clothes and into his pajamas, and lay down in bed before he let it take him. They knew, both of them, that it was too late. It wasn’t a regret, or even a chance untaken. It was just a choice they had never made, and nothing more. There was a gentle sadness in him, a vast wondering question in his heart. He closed his eyes and took a deep breath before he heard the door open behind him in the dark. Soft footsteps crossed the floor, and his blanket lifted. Rolling over, he put his arms around her and pulled her close, holding her tightly as tears dropped silently onto his pillow.

title: The Cabin

question: Summarise what the story says about the relationship between Jenny and the protagonist.

answer: The protagonist goes to the cabin and cleans it. His friend Jenny arrives early while he is cleaning and they joke around, before they spend the day cleaning and joking in the cabin. He has unrequited feelings for Jenny and wants to tell her that he loves her.

critique: The protagonist has had these feelings for years

critique: The protagonist doesn't tell her that he loves her.

critique: The protagonist and Jenny are not friends. They are old friends.

critique: It is omitted that Jenny reveals her true feelings when she asks "tell me something I don’t know." He realizes that he can't deny it as she almost telepathically knew what was in his heart.

critique: The response is missing information about Jenny and the protagonist.

critique: The protagonist and Jenny are not in a romantic relationship.

critique: The protagonist doesn't want to tell Jenny that he loves her. He wants to tell her that he loves her, but it's too late.

critique: The protagonist doesn't want to tell Jenny he loves her.


text:
If you play by the rules, it will only keep you out of trouble. I am in trouble. Tonight is my last night working for Multiple Services. I have not been fired yet, but when my supervisor reads the email I sent her in the morning, I will be fired for sure – I am sure of it.

I used to do security at the Pearl district but I was recently transferred to American Plaza Towers. My new manager has a different set of standards. My dark brown boots being one of them – security 'officers' are supposed to wear black boots. But that's not the problem.

Tonight I am on shift with Emily, the graveyard guard. I am working the D shift, which intersects with her shift. I am not with her right now. Her shift has a lot more responsibilities than mine. I am in the lounge room, lounging. I don't need to worry about doing any checks because she has the 'snitch stick' – it's a little stick we poke into little tags that prove that we are working.  I am at low risk of being caught in here, the lounge room is closed during this time of night. It doesn't matter what I do. I will be fired in the morning anyway.

Currently Emily is doing some tower checks. She is only required to do one tower check a night, but she does multiple for 'brownie points'. No one ever gets promoted. Well, unless someone gets fired or dies or quits. A lot of people recently got fired because... 'they are not with us anymore' says Gerry, the supervisor at APC. Emily was not at liberty to tell me why, but it has something to do with 'vices'.

I needed to take a shit. I was already in the lounge room so the bathroom was so close I basically just took my pants down. My ass wouldn’t cooperate with me —the last little bit hung in between my butt cheeks like a hand trying to catch a dollar bill falling to the ground. I hate this, being forced into vulgarity; I want to let go of the turd. My butt thinks the turd is valuable, I guess.

 The women's bathroom next to me started making noise. Emily must be relieving herself as well. I finished long after she did. I left the bathroom unclean because the toilet finally clogged.  Maintenance can handle it in the morning, fuck it. When I left, I saw Emily at the exit of the room, holding the door open waiting for me to leave. I walked out, uncomfortably — I didn't wipe enough. She locked the door behind us.

I entered the elevator. She joined me. I pressed the button to the basement with plans to hang out in a storage room and read. She pressed the button to the 26th floor and I got caught into doing a tower check with her. She invited me to smoke some cigarettes on the roof and talk. I don't smoke, but it sounded like a good offer.

“So how do you like it so far?” She asked.

“The elevator ride?”

“The job.”

“oh... uh, well...” I stalled, “APC lives up to it's reputation.”

“Ah, yes. You need not say more.”

There was a long silence that was only broken with a 'ding' each time we passed a floor.

“So,” I finally said, “What do the people in these condominiums do for a living?”

“Most of them are retired. That's why there are so many care givers here. But one of them I know sells stuff on Ebay. The guy never went to college and he quit his job to start up a business."

Some nerve, I thought.

"These people are all rich," she said, "somehow or another. Each time you hear that ding, the price of a room goes up."

There was a small stair case past the breezeway on the top floor that led to a freshly painted door that was bent out of shape. This door led to the roof.  She told me the correct key was the square key. I fumbled with my set for a while and found it. I attempted to open the door and she told me the key to opening the door is to shout the correct sequence of curse words. After a few moments, I understood what she meant. I was not saying the right words. She got her key out and did it in a snap.

“I've been here a while,” she said, “you get used to it.”

I wasn't used to smoking but  I really like the motions it conduces with my hand. I told her that's the only thing I like about smoking. She said that's what got her into it.

I stared out at the skyline of the city, at the skyscrapers that reach so high into society – to heights I admit I will never achieve. The view was almost worth it. I won't be able to pay for college after tonight.

“Gerry is probably going to fire me tomorrow.”

“Why?”

“She wants my DPSST card number, but I don't have it... I... lost it....”

“Well, you can just call in to get the number, right? It's in the system."

“I don't have my card.”

“Huh... I'll just go ahead and say I didn't hear you say that when she brings it up.” We took some drags. “I don't want to be here forever, you know," she said finally.

“You don't say.”

“Yeah, some people stay here for years. This job is perfect for people like you... who want to get through college. But after two or three years, it's like, what are you doing with your life?”

“What do you want to do with your life?”

“I used to go to college, but I stopped taking courses because I didn't feel like they were taking me anywhere. The guy down at Plaid Pantry has a masters degree in engineering. Right now I try to come up with something new every night and research if it's been done before. It usually has.  Basically, the way I look at it, entrepreneurism is the only way to make it in this world now. My dad has this business, it's pretty successful. Basically, he helps other people be successful.”

“Nice. Why don't you get him to help you?”

“We're not on good terms... he just wants me to successful... I'm just a security guard..." We took some drags. "The choice here is you can do a side project and hope it turns into something... or, what else are you going to do?”

“We should probably finish this tower check.”

“Right.”

We started down the tower, checking every floor. I shifted my underwear around, but it was no use. I walked uncomfortably the whole way down. Just gotta pull through.

Half way down the tower, there was a place to tag the snitch stick. Emily brought up some statistic that the vast majority of Americans all believe that some day they will all be rich, that's why they all don't support the dynasty tax. I said that was nice and waited for the chance to lounge in the lounge room again.

It was the end of my shift — the last few minutes of my having a job. As I left, I said, “see ya”. I didn't look back and would probably never see her again, but I heard Emily say “have fun”.

title: What Else Are You Going To Do?

question: Summarize the narrator's movements throughout the building.

answer: The narrator dark brown boots are not standard security officer wear, so at the start of the job, he did not feel as though he belonged. He is moved from the Pearl district to the American Plaza Towers. He is originally in the lounge room but Emily, the graveyard guard, has the snitch stick, so the narrator is not worried about being caught. He goes to the women's bathroom where Emily is also relieving herself, and then enters the basement with plans to hang out in a storage room and read. Emily invites him to come up to the roof to smoke some cigarettes and talk.

critique: The narrator's movements are not described in the story.

critique: The narrator's movements are not listed chronologically. They are listed as they are relevant to the story.

critique: The narrator's movements are not mentioned in the text.

critique: The narrator's movements are not limited to the Pearl district, American Plaza Towers, and the basement.

critique: The narrator is not worried about being caught because Emily has the snitch stick.

question: Summarize the topics the narrator and Emily discuss.

answer: The topics the narrator and Emily discuss are the nature of their jobs, the nature of their lives, and the nature of their futures. They discuss the nature of their jobs, the nature of their lives, and the nature of their futures.

critique: The repetition of the word "nature" is unnecessary.

critique: The repetition of "nature" is unnecessary.

critique: The part about their future should be in past tense.

question: What does the story say about the narrator's feelings about Emily?

answer: The narrator is on his last night working for Multiple Services. He is sure he will be fired the next day. He is on shift with Emily, the graveyard guard. He is lounging in the lounge room, and Emily is doing some tower checks. The narrator is in the lounge room and Emily is in the women's bathroom. He is uncomfortable with the thought of leaving the bathroom unclean. The narrator enters the elevator with Emily. He is not comfortable with smoking. He is not sure if he will see Emily again.

critique: The response is missing the narrator's feelings about Emily.

critique: The narrator's feelings about Emily are not mentioned.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: This is not about the narrator's feelings about Emily.

critique: The narrator's feelings about Emily are not mentioned in the story.

question: Summarize the narrator's poor behavior during his shift

answer: The narrator is lounging in the lounge room during his shift. He leaves the bathroom unclean after relieving himself. He does not want to do a tower check with Emily, but he gets caught into doing it. He does not want to smoke cigarettes with Emily, but he does it anyway. He does not want to clean up after himself in the bathroom, but he does not clean it up. He does not want to do the tower check, but he does it anyway. He does not want to say goodbye to Emily, but he does it anyway.

critique: The narrator does not want to do the tower check, but he does it anyway.

critique: The narrator does want to say goodbye to Emily (he hopes to never see her again).

critique: This is inaccurate. The narrator does want to do the tower check.

critique: The narrator does not want to clean up after himself in the bathroom, but he does not clean it up.

critique: The narrator does not want to say goodbye to Emily, but he does it anyway.

critique: "He does not want to say goodbye to Emily, but he does it anyway." - is incorrect. The narrator did not want to say goodbye to Emily because he was not going to see her again.

critique: The narrator does not want to do the tower check, but he does not do it.

text: The response contains inaccurate information. For example, the narrator not wanting to clean himself is false as he seems not to realize at the time that he did not wipe himself clean.