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The SHARP-TAILED SNAKE or SHARPTAIL SNAKE (_Contia tenuis_) is a small species of snake in the family Colubridae. The species is endemic to the Western United States and British Columbia.

Common names

Additional common names for _C. tenuis_ include brown snake, gentle brown snake, Oregon worm snake, Pacific brown snake, Pacific ground snake, and purple-tailed snake.[1]

Geographic range

_C. tenuis_ is distributed through the states of California, Oregon, and Washington, as well as British Columbia, Canada: Southern Vancouver Island, British Columbia around Victoria, British Columbia,[2] and a newly discovered site in Pemberton, British Columbia.[3][4]

Description

The sharp-tailed snake has an average total length (including tail) of as an adult. It is distinguished by its sharp tail spine, which is the protruding tip of the last tail vertebra. The spine is not toxic and cannot injure humans. Rather, the tail is used to stabilize small prey, such as slugs, for consumption. The dorsal surface ranges in color from grayish brown to brown to brick red, with bubble-gum pink and peachy-orange specimens occasionally found. The ventral surface is a striking series of black and white crossbars.[5]

Behavior

The sharp-tailed snake is a shy, secretive creature most often encountered under rocks and logs, and rarely to never found in the open.[6] It is able to persist in urban areas where appropriate cover can be found. It is known to burrow into soft soil or cracks in the clay, and may be encountered by people who are digging in the garden or removing concrete. When encountered, the sharp-tailed snake may roll into a ball and remain still. It can be mistaken for a worm by the casual observer.

Diet

The diet of _C. tenuis_ is largely restricted to slugs and eggs of slugs.[7]

Reproduction

The adult female _C. tenuis_ lays 4–16 eggs in the summer, underground or in a burrow. Each hatchling is in total length (including tail).

[1] Wright AH, Wright AA (1957). _Handbook of Snakes of the United States and Canada_. Ithaca and London: Comstock Publishing Associates, a Division of Cornell University Press. 1,105 pp. (in two volumes). (_Contia tenuis_, pp. 156–160, Figure 49, Map 18).

[2] “Sharp-tailed Snake”. The Reptiles of British Columbia. British Columbia Ministry of Environment. www.bcreptiles.ca. 1

[3] Atkinson, Cathryn (2013). “Rare snakes found in Pemberton: Proposed Pemberton development area home to snakes on federal list of species at risk”. _Pique_. August 15, 2013. www.piquenewsmagazine.com. 2

[4] South Coast Conservation Program Regional Dialogues on Land Use Planning for Species and Ecosystems at Risk. Proceedings Fall 2013. 3

[5] Stebbins RC (2003). _A Field Guide to Western Reptiles and Amphibians, Third Edition_. The Peterson Field Guide Series ®. Boston and New York: Houghton Mifflin Company. xiii + 533 pp., 56 plates. . (_Contia tenuis_, pp. 346–347 + Plate 46 + Map 134).

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title: Sharp-tailed snake

question: What does the text say about cobras?

answer: No answer

critique: The question asks for information that is not in the text.

critique: "No answer" is not a correct response. The text does not mention anything about cobras.

question: What does the text say about the Sharp-tailed Snake?

answer: The Sharp-tailed Snake or Sharptail Snake, also known as brown snake, gentle brown snake, Oregon worm snake, Pacific brown snake, Pacific ground snake, and purple-tailed snake, is a small species of snake in the family Colubridae. The species is endemic to the Western United States and British Columbia. It is a shy, secretive creature often found under rocks and logs, and rarely in the open. The Sharp-tailed Snake is rarely found in the open and is typically hidden, so it can be mistaken for a worm by the casual observer.

critique: The last sentence is not relevant to the question.

question: How does the text describe the Sharptail Snake?

answer: It is a timid, shy creature that is often mistaken for a worm. It can also be mistaken for a slug.

critique: The text does not say that the snake can be mistaken for a slug.

question: What does the text say about the behavior of the Sharptail snake?

answer: The Sharptail snake is a shy, secretive creature. It is usually found under rocks and logs and is rarely found in the open. It can be found in urban areas where appropriate cover is available. It often buries itself into the soft soil or cracks in clay, where it can be mistaken for a worm by the casual observer.

critique: The snake rolls into a ball and remains still, so it can be mistaken for a worm.

critique: The answer should mention that the snake rolls into a ball when it is encountered.

critique: The last line of the sentence about the clay cracks can be replaced with a line about rolling into a ball.


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JIM MCLAUGHLIN (born November 18, 1960)[1] is an American volleyball coach. He was most recently the head coach of the women's volleyball team at Notre Dame.[2]

Teams under McLaughlin's coaching have accomplished two national championships, six Final Four appearances (most recently in 2013), six trips to the Elite Eight, two national players of the year, three Pac-12 (formerly the Pac-10) Conference titles, and 13 players that combined for 28 AVCA All-America awards. McLaughlin was named the 2004 NCAA National Coach of the Year and received the 2002, 2004, 2005, and 2013 Pac-12 Coach of the Year awards.

Before Washington, he spent seven seasons as the men's head coach at USC, where he won the 1990 national championship and finished as runner-up in 1991, followed by a four-year run in the Big 12 Conference leading the women's program at Kansas State.

Through the 2013 season, McLaughlin had a 326-87 () record with the Huskies in 13 seasons.

Collegiate career

McLaughlin attended Santa Monica Junior College (1980–81), where he played volleyball for two years and transferred to UC Santa Barbara (1982–83). He was the Gauchos' starting setter for two seasons, earning honorable mention All-America honors as a senior.

Head coach

USC

McLaughlin was the head coach for the USC Trojans men's volleyball team for seven seasons. In his first year as head coach in 1990, he led the Trojans to the NCAA Men's Volleyball Championship match, defeating Long Beach State, and finished as runner-up the following year. While at USC, McLaughlin's teams were ranked in the top 10 five times, while 15 players earned All-America accolades, led by two-time national player of the year Bryan Ivie.

Kansas State

McLaughlin spent four seasons building the Kansas State women's program into a national power; he compiled an 82-43 () record and took the Wildcats to four consecutive NCAA tournaments. In his final season, McLaughlin led Kansas State to a 22-9 () record, a program-best No. 16 national ranking and its first-ever trip to the NCAA Sweet 16, before losing to top-seeded Wisconsin.

During his tenure in Manhattan, two Wildcats earned All-America honors, seven were named to the All-Big 12 first team and 15 garnered first-team academic all-conference accolades. McLaughlin also was honored as the 1999 Big 12 Conference Coach of the Year.

Washington

When McLaughlin took over the Washington program in 2001, the team was last in the Pac-10 Conference. In his first year at UW, he led the Huskies to an 11-16 record and a 4-14 mark in the Pac-10. The team's 11 wins in 2001 were the most for the program since 1997. Just one year later, the Huskies went 20-11 and made the NCAA second round. Since 2003, Washington has not won fewer than 23 matches or lost more than nine in any season.[3]

In 2004, the Huskies won their first-ever Pac-10 title, and McLaughlin earned his first AVCA National Coach of the Year honor. In his fifth year at UW in 2005, he led Washington to its first-ever NCAA Women's Volleyball Championship and a 32-1 () record as Washington swept all six of their matches in the tournament,[4] including top-ranked Nebraska in the final at the Alamodome in San Antonio.[5] McLaughlin was named the Pac-10 Coach of the Year, and made history as the first coach in NCAA history to win a national championship in both men and women's volleyball, having led the USC men's team to a national title in 1990.[6]

In 2006, he led UW to its third straight national semifinal, but the Dawgs fell to runner-up Stanford.[7][8]

The NCAA Championships were hosted in Seattle at KeyArena at Seattle Center in 2013. The Huskies, led by AVCA National Player of the Year and Honda Award Winner Krista Vansant, won the Pac-12 title and reached the Final Four, but fell in straight sets in the semifinals to eventual national champion Penn State.[9][10]

In his 13 years as head coach, McLaughlin established Washington volleyball as a championship-caliber team. Under his leadership, Washington made an appearance in the NCAA Tournament every year except in his first year in 2001 and boasts a .789 winning percentage. There have been 51 players that have been honored with All-Conference selections, 50 Academic All-Conference honorees, 31 All-Americans and 8 Academic All-Americans since McLaughlin’s arrival.[11]

Notre Dame

McLaughlin was named the women's volleyball head coach at the University of Notre Dame on January 17, 2015. He resigned his position in June 2018 due to severe back issues. [12]

Quick facts

-   winning percentage at UW (through 2013)

-   31 All-Americans
-   51 All-Conference selections
-   50 Academics All-Conference honorees
-   24 Professional Players produced
-   12 Straight NCAA Tournament appearances
-     8 Academic All-Americans
-     4 Final Four Appearances
-     1 National Championship

Head coaching record

Men's college volleyball

Women's college volleyball

-   Final Pac-10 season was 2010; became Pac-12 in 2011

Awards and honors

-   2013 – Pac-12 Coach of the Year
-   2005 – Pac-10 Coach of the Year
-   2004 – AVCA National Coach of the Year, AVCA Pacific Region Coach of the Year, Pac-10 Coach of the Year
-   2002 – Pac-10 Coach of the Year
-   1999 – Big 12 Coach of the Year

Personal

Jim is married to the former Margaret Jarc, a four-year soccer monogram winner at the University of Notre Dame. They have three daughters, Megan, Molly, and Marit.

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title: Jim McLaughlin (coach)

question: What does the text say about the skills needed to become a volleyball player?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the text doesn't say anything about the skills needed to become a volleyball player.

critique: No response to the question is given in the text.

critique: The answer should mention that the text does not say anything about the skills needed to become a volleyball player.

question: What does the text say about Jim McLaughlin's collegiate career?

answer: Jim McLaughlin attended Santa Monica Junior College, where he played volleyball during 1980-1981 and transferred to UC Santa Barbara in 1982-1983. In Santa Barbara, he played as a starter for two seasons and earned honorable mention for All America honors, becoming a senior.

critique: The answer should mention that he was the Gauchos' starting setter.

critique: It is omitted that he was the Gauchos' starting setter for two seasons.

question: Summarize McLaughlin's head coaching career.

answer: He was the head coach for the USC Trojans men's volleyball team for seven seasons, where he led the Trojans to the NCAA Men's Volleyball Championship match in 1990 and finished as runner-up the following year. He was the head coach for the Kansas State women's volleyball team for four seasons, where he compiled an 82-43 record and took the Wildcats to four consecutive NCAA tournaments. He was the head coach for the Washington Huskies women's volleyball team for 13 seasons, where he led the Huskies to an 11-16 record in his first year and an NCAA Women's Volleyball Championship in 2005.

critique: The answer should mention that McLaughlin was the head coach for the Notre Dame women's volleyball team.

critique: The answer should mention the Notre Dame team.

question: What are some of McLaughlin's most notable accomplishments?

answer: He was head coach for the USC Trojans men's volleyball team for seven seasons. He led the Trojans to the NCAA Men's Volleyball Championship match, defeating Long Beach State, and finished as runner-up the following year. His teams were ranked in the top 10 five times, while 15 players earned All-America accolades, led by two-time national player of the year Bryan Ivie. McLaughlin also lead the USC men's team to a national title in 1990. McLaughlin was the head coach for the Washington Huskies women's volleyball team for 13 seasons. He led the Huskies to an 11-16 record and a 4-14 mark in the Pac-10. The team's 11 wins in 2001 were the most for the program since 1997. Just one year later, the Huskies went 20-11 and made the NCAA second round. McLaughlin was named the Pac-10 Coach of the Year, and made history as the first coach in NCAA history to win a national championship in both men and women's volleyball, having led the USC men's team to a national title in 1990.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The answer is a copy-paste of McLaughlin's coaching record. It's not really a summary of his accomplishments.


text:
    During life people are called many things, some good, some bad. Within a short eight years I’ve been called; a student, worker, son, good listener, hero, savior, and many more. Since I was ten I’ve been talking people out of suicide online. During my eight years of helping people, I’ve helped many people, created an online organization, and learned many new things. This has forever and will constantly change my life.

    Many people ask me, how did this happen? How does a ten year old get mixed up with people’s lives? It was three days after my tenth birthday, the smell of my moms homemade cake was still tangible in the air. I logged onto the computer and found a chat room. I came across a man inside the room. He was talking about ending his life because his wife was cheating on him and getting his kids. My heart was in my ears beating hard, my palms were clammy and wet like a river. I talked with him till late in the night past any ten year olds bed time. This man was set and ready to die, a mere child stopped him. Me.

    A few months after helping the man, I met a girl my age who was rather interested in the “work” I did. She wanted to be part of the action. Lillie and I decided to work together helping people we would find in chat rooms. This continued for about a year. Lillie started to struggle with herself, the constant pressure of someone’s life in your hands at that young of an age takes a heavy toll upon the beholder. Lillie messaged me one night, “Dominic I have a problem” I asked her what it was and she stated, she wanted to die. She couldn’t take helping people anymore. I remember crying, panicking, wanting her to see it my way and not do what she was planning. It all ended so fast only three words remained “Lillie Signed Off.”

    Three years have passed since Lillie’s death, I created an online organization, filled with teens helping people out of dark thoughts. I created this organization in memory of Lillie. DarkShadows. DarkShadows, was constructed of teens from around the world, looking for people with suicidal thoughts that wanted to help prevent suicide. One hundred and ninety-seven teens joined DarkShadows. Each night we would have meetings and we would talk with one another to see if everyone was ok. I learned that this “job” is to hard for one child to take on alone day in and day out, there needs to be an escape route. DarkShadows showed some amazing results, the teens in DarkShadows were able to talk to five hundred plus people out of suicide. With every construction there is a destruction.

    I had a hard time destroying DarkShadows for I was proud of it. I closed down DarkShadows because the stress was enormous, two people were talking people into suicide, three people committed suicide from the pressure, and people started to not care. DarkShadows lasted three years and I was shocked that I could uphold it for so long, but I knew it had to go. I will never forget what I’ve learned from these past experiences.

    I’ve learned, many things over the past few years. I’ve learned that even though the world seems to burn like a raging fireball, there are many people out there still that care for others. I’ve learned that it doesn’t take a hero to save someone, you don’t need a utility belt, powers, cape, gadgets, or a “cool” name to save someone. All you need is a heart, and the will power, and the determination. Everyone is a hero in a way, you’re a hero to your kid, give someone some change for the bus, do something that is not expected from you. You are a hero.

    My life has changed drastically due to this “job”. I have become a better listener, I became mature, I met new people. I think back from when I was ten, I would have never imagined that helping that one guy would take me this far. I feel that due to this, I have a good understanding of people. I can “read” them easier. At times I have thought is it worth it? Is it worth spending hours upon hours helping someone that I don’t even know? When you help someone the end result of them being alive thanks to you is by far the best feeling you can think of. My life will never be the same due to this and for that I am grateful.

    During my short life span I’ve been a lot of things and experienced even more things. Do these names and experiences define me? Or simply give a better understanding of me? By helping one man live through the loss of his wife and kids. I met a great friend that I hold dear in my heart. I became a leader, making tough decisions for a lot of people. I learned, people still care for one another in this world. This has ultimately affected, and effected my life forever and I will never forget it. To be a Hero, you don’t need a cape or a utility belt, just a heart.

title: To Be A Hero You Need A Heart (True Story)

question: What would have happened if Lillie did not kill herself?

answer: Dominic owns and runs DarkShadows, a global organization that tries to help people in need as well as prevent suicide. If Lillie did not kill herself and was still part of his life, Dominic would have never created DarkShadows.

critique: The answer is a bit speculative. It is possible that Dominic would have started the group even if Lillie did not kill herself.

critique: "Dominic owns and runs DarkShadows, a global organization that tries to help people in need as well as prevent suicide. If Lillie did not kill herself and was still part of his life, Dominic would have never created DarkShadows." - this is incorrect. Dominic created DarkShadows because he was inspired by Lillie's death.

critique: Dominic created DarkShadows in memory of Lillie.


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We were enjoying the cool night air. I lit a cigarette and took a quick harsh drag. My friend sat next me, quiet. He wouldn’t admit his thoughts, but I could see them on his face. I sat with the cigarette between fingers, slowly burning down, quickly giving me a buzz, relieving my stress. He was waiting for a text. I was waiting for anything. That night I wore shorts and a sweater: comfortably chilled. I can’t remember, but it is possible that we had been drinking.

From the vantage point of my friend’s porch we could see them approach her building and stand just outside her door. She was anxious. He, as always, was calm and cool.

I turned to my friend, “Do you see this?” I took a drag, eager for what happened next.

They stood there. Talking. His jeans loose, hems on the concrete, striped hoody, and backwards flat-billed baseball cap, all synonymous with his profile. She wore a skirt, netted leggings underneath, large boots coming half way up her calf, a low cut shirt and a half buttoned up purple cardigan sweater, her sunset red hair kept neat under a black beret. These two friends stood talking in the dark of night; thinking that they were alone in this moment. That for a few minutes the world was theirs. I watched on, ignorant to my friend’s presence and text chimes. In my mind I saw and heard their conversation. She was thanking him for being a good guy to walk her home. He said it was nothing and that he was happy to do it; “No problem.” One of them checked their phone, probably he did. He motioned to go. She asked him to wait. She stepped in for a hug and embraced him. He wasn’t reluctant, he didn’t stop to think about the implications, and he did not consider his girlfriend hundreds of miles away. He didn’t think about how much his girlfriend meant to him, and he didn’t consider how much this girl holding him right now wanted to be more than friends. He held her tight in his arms. And he released first. She held a second longer, understanding that now, given the circumstances, and his obligations, that he could not be with her. She turned to unlock her door; she pulled it open and stood there, holding it. One hand on the door, the other hanging at her side. They said goodbye, he turned and walked away. But she didn’t turn in. She stood there.

I was fixated on her. I wanted to walk over to her and tell her I’m sorry it wouldn’t work out with him. I wanted to run after him and tell him what he’s doing to her. But I couldn’t. I watched her. This image is cast in my mind like stone. The yellow lights on the wall above her emitting their soft enveloping glow. The way she held most of her weight on one foot. Her head cocked slightly to one side and inclined towards his fleeting presence. And my friend reclined on next to me. Cigarette smoke drifting before my face in the breeze.

To me this moment only lasted about fifteen seconds. She watched after him. I saw in her body language how she registered the ramifications of their conversation and interactions. Her body slouched. Her hand fell off the door letting it swing in, stopping against her shoulder. She loosened her firm stance and stepped one foot back to turn, but she couldn’t yet. She had to watch him a few seconds longer; she had to hope that he’d changed; that maybe he did feel the same way for her. Hoped that maybe he’d turn back for her. I could only imagine how long this felt for her, the emotions she felt as he went farther away, without looking back: the impact of his words tonight, the realizations within that hug, the disappointment and despondency of that brief moment. She finally turned in—sad, lonely, defeated. I felt sorry for her. I felt guilty that I had intruded on this moment; that I watched something that was supposed to be private and within only her world.

I finished my cigarette, crushed the butt, and threw it away.

title: A Goodbye (ws please)

question: What is the theme of the story?

answer: The theme of the story is unrequited love.

critique: "The theme of the story is unrequited love." - while the story is about unrequited love, the theme is more about the feeling of guilt and the inability to help someone in need.

question: Summarize the narrator's perspective on this rejection scenario.

answer: The narrator sees that the situation is very upsetting to the girl, and is sorry for her. He knows he shouldn't have been there to witness it, but he couldn't help it. He knows that he would feel differently than the girl does.

critique: This doesn't make much sense. The narrator knows he would feel differently because he's a guy, and he's not the one getting rejected.

critique: The narrator does not know how he would feel if he were in the girl's position.

critique: The narrator is not sure how he would feel if he were in the girl's shoes.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator saw the rejection as an opportunity to feel better about his own life.

critique: The answer omits the narrator's feelings about the situation.

critique: The perspective is not primarily about the girl or about the boy or about public versus private. "I felt sorry for her. I felt guilty that I had intruded on this moment" Man, we feel we must honor privacy and stay out of the affairs of others. He feels bad because he has seen something that he should not have.

critique: The narrator is not sure how he would feel in the same situation.

question: Summarize the plot twist in the story.

answer: The narrator and his friend are watching the couple from the porch. The narrator is fixated on the woman, and he can see her emotions. He feels sorry for her. He finishes his cigarette and throws it away.

critique: The plot twist is that the man rejects the woman after she asks him to wait for her.

question: Explain how the narrator is able to realistically assume what happened during this interaction.

answer: The narrator is able to assume what happened during this interaction because he is able to hear their conversation in his mind.

critique: The narrator can't hear their conversation in his mind; he's just watching them.

text: The answer should say that the narrator was watching the body language between the girl and his friend.

category: coverage


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The only thing legible on the newspaper was January 12th, 2012, as it was ripped apart by the tires of a speeding car on West Avenue. West Avenue was the street Melanie Smith used on her way to and from school every day.

The clock struck three, and the school bell rang. All the children ran out of their classrooms full of liberation with the afternoon now their own. The students came bursting out of the front door of the school as if it were a competition to see who could leave first. After escaping the crowd, Melanie took her normal route home down West Avenue. She noticed a large white van, the type stereotypically used for kidnapping, had been following her since she left school. She wasn’t nervous though. Melanie was full of the adolescent spirit, and she held firmly to the idea that nothing bad could happen to her. The van sped up, and stopped about 30 yards in front of Melanie. As she walked by she was quickly taken into the van by a masked and an unmasked man. The scene was oddly anticlimactic. Real life isn’t much like the movies. There isn’t any considerable competition in terms of strength when it comes to a twelve year old girl and two fully grown men. Once back in the van, the masked man said, “Don’t worry young lady. We aren’t going to hurt you. We’re just trying to get your father’s attention.”
The unmasked driver remained silent.

The idea was the masked and the unmasked man would kidnap Melanie Smith, and by using her Father’s love for her against him they could get leverage over his hefty bank account. At least that was the plan.
Finally the van stopped, and the unmasked driver let out a deep sigh. He turned the van off, unbuckled himself, and got out without saying a word. The ground crunched under his weight as he walked to the sliding side door of the van. His walking stopped and the sound of a gun being cocked pierced the silent air. A moment later a loud echoing shot blew through the van’s door. The masked man inside went limp and slouched over. A dark pool of blood began diffusing from his body. Melanie wasn’t quite sure how to respond. She managed to put up a bigger fight when the unmasked man grabbed her, but she was easily overpowered and carried into a house.
The man chuckled at Melanie’s fear. In a very calm and controlled voice he said, “I was just like you when I was a kid. I was so full of ignorance. Then one day, I came home from school, just like you were a little while ago, and found both of my parents dead. The man who had murdered them was sitting on our couch watching television and drinking beer.” The unmasked man smiled at Melanie and continued, “The man stood up from the couch and walked towards me. I was paralyzed with fear. He grabbed my head, and he said he wanted me to remember him for the rest of my life. So he did this.” The man pointed at his scar which resided from the edge of his lip all the way to his ear. He looked at Melanie with a blank gaze for a few moments, and then he turned and walked to the refrigerator and grabbed a beer. “You want one?” he asked.
Melanie remained silent.

“Yeah, I didn’t like the taste of beer when I was your age either, but it grows on you.” He laughed. “Anyway, let’s get down to business.” The unmasked man grabbed his cell phone and dialed a number. It rang until it went to voicemail.

“Hello, this is Richard Smith. I can’t get to the phone right now. Please leave your name and your number. I’ll get back to you as soon as I can.”

The unmasked man sighed and said, “I have your daughter. Call me back at 567-9845, or I’ll kill her.” The phone rang almost as soon as he hung up. The unmasked man was quick and to the point. He demanded that Richard come to the house. Richard Smith was a nice man. He provided for his family the best he could, and he encouraged Melanie in everything she found interest in. Richard even donated a significant amount of money to the local food bank every month, because he thought everyone deserved to be helped. He was the change he wanted to see in the world.

Filled with fear and anger Richard rushed to get all his money that he expected a kidnapper to want, and he went to the address the man had given him. He arrived at the house and ran to the front door. He was greeted with the sight of a man holding a gun to his daughter’s head.

The unmasked man said, “Come in Richard. Have a seat.”

Richard walked across the room and sat down.

“Very good Richard. Can I offer you a beer?”

Richard obviously growing angrier by the moment threw the bag of money to the middle of the room and asked, “Can I please take my daughter and leave? That’s all my money.”

The unmasked man laughed and said, “It’s not about money. Money was my partner’s desire.” He then commanded, “Go into the last room at the end of the hall or I’ll blow your daughter’s brain all over the fucking wall.”

As Richard arrived in the room he was struck in the back of the head with the butt of a gun which knocked him out.

“You back with us Richard?” The unmasked man laughed with glee. Richard came to, and he found himself ducked taped to a metal chair in the middle of a room. In front of him was his daughter.

“Do you know why the nice and peaceful life just doesn’t work Richard? It’s because a nice, relaxing picnic is too easily ended with a machinegun. That’s the reason you’re taped to a chair in some stranger’s house.” The unmasked man let out a sigh. “But don’t worry Richard. When it comes right down to it, I’m no better off than you.” The unmasked man began pacing behind Richard and said, “You see a guy like me, a real bad guy, has the same fate as a good guy like you and a naïve child like Melanie. What we do in life has no meaning in the scheme of it all Richard. It always ends the same.”

Richard began struggling trying to break the tape but his efforts were futile. He looked at his daughter and said, “Everything is going to be alright. I promise.”

The unmasked man stopped pacing and faced Melanie, “Oh no Melanie. Everything is not going to be alright. Things are not alright in the slightest.”

A loud click could be heard from below the floor, and the vents opened.

The unmasked man said, “You’ll be gazing down the yawning void in no time.”

The room gradually filled with poisonous fumes, and Richard, the unmasked man, and Melanie all expired.

title: The Good, Bad, and the Naïve

question: What is the twist in the story?

answer: The kidnappers are killed by the fumes.

critique: The kidnappers are not killed by the fumes, they are killed by the man who does not want to be identified.

critique: It's the kidnappers that are killed, not the kidnappers AND the kidnappers. Melanie and her father also die.

critique: The kidnappers are not killed by the fumes.

critique: The kidnappers are killed by the kidnapper.

critique: The kidnappers aren't killed by the fumes.

text: The response should mention that the unmasked kidnapper willing lets himself get killed by the fumes.

category: accuracy

question: What is the meaning of the story's title?

answer: The story is about a kidnapping, which the title seems to be pointing toward. The kidnappers are only referred to as the "man" and "the unmasked man". In the end, we learn that the kidnapping is not about money at all and the kidnappers are killed as well.

critique: The answer does not directly answer the question.

critique: The answer should be more specific about what the title means.

text: The question is very subjective, and the passage also does not explain or reference the title at any point.

category: other

category_text: unable to be answered


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[COLÉGIO SANTO ANTÔNIO entrance (at reforms) at _Pernambuco street_, in Belo Horizonte.] COLÉGIO SANTO ANTÔNIO (ST. ANTHONY SCHOOL) is a Brazilian Franciscan school located in the Savassi neighborhood of Belo Horizonte, Minas Gerais. It is maintained by _Casa de Santo Antonio_ (St. Anthony House).[1]

History

Colégio Santo Antônio was established at São João del Rei, Minas Gerais, on May 1, 1909, by the Order of Friars Minor.[2] It distinguished itself as a benchmark of education, welcoming students from all over the country.

In the late 1940s, the school was moved to Belo Horizonte, the state capital, to better prepare students for the Federal University of Minas Gerais, then known as the University of Minas Gerais.

Under the direction of Brother Bertrando, Pedro Schretlen and others, the school was moved to 880 Pernambuco Street on February 17, 1950, where an inaugural mass was celebrated in a makeshift chapel. The school also began to support the autonomy of the new Franciscan province. That same year, the school added seven science classes, and offered its first gym classes two years later.

In 1972, the unit of São João del Rei (High School San Antonio) ceased operations, making the building available for other public projects. In the old building, the Municipal Foundation of São João del Rei was started, which was one of the entities forming the Federal University of São João del-Rei. The Franciscans kept the school true to the principles of the order. After the death of Brother Bertrando, the school went under the direction of Frei Felix, from 1959 to 1962. From 1962 to 1967, Frei Humbertino Backes, Eduardo Copray and Giraldi oversaw school operations. Frei Aristides Kasbergen managed the school from 1967 to 1984, Fr Dario Campos from 1984 to 1991, and Hilário Meekes from 1991 to 2000.

In 2002 and 2003, Zé Roberto and Pedro discontinued their leadership of the school, and Frei Flávio Silva Vieira continued the work in the area of pastoral care. Frei Jonas Nogueira da Costa took over the ministry in late 2006. Frei Jacir de Freitas Faria has been Director General and Pedagogical since late 2006. Since late 2007, Frei Alexsandro Rufino da Silva has been the Director of Administration and Finance.

In 2018 the educational institution became a member of the UNESCO Associated Schools Program Network (PEA / Unesco).[3][4]

Chronology

[Banner celebrating the school's centenary.]

-   1909 - Foundation of the school at São João del-Rei
-   1950 - Inauguration of the headquarters in Belo Horizonte, initially focused on science
-   1964 - Inauguration of the Shrine of St. Anthony
-   1977 - Installation of _Coleginho_ (little school) for early elementary school education
-   1992 - Implementation of the teaching of informatics
-   1999 - Implementation of an educational gratuity project to serve disadvantaged students

Characteristics

[_Coleginho_.] Colégio Santo Antônio (CSA) is maintained by the Association of Franciscan Education and Welfare. It belongs to the _Province of Santa Cruz_, internal division of the Order of the Friars Minor, founded in 1209 by St. Francis of Assisi.

The directors of the school are Frei Jacir de Freitas Faria (Educational and General), Fr Alexsandro Rufino da Silva (Administrative and Financial) and Frei Jonas Nogueira da Costa (Pastoral). On May 1, 2009, the school had been in operation for 100 years.

A series of extra-curricular activities in sports and the arts are offered by the school. Students take classes in guitar, violin, flute, ballet, jazz, folk dancing, soccer, handball, volleyball, and basketball. The school also has three choirs and an experimental orchestra.

The school won fourth place in Brazil in the High School Nacional Exam (_ENEM_) 2008.[5]

Campuses

The school has a primary education facility (_Coleginho_), located at Rua Pernambuco, 732 (Funcionários neighborhood). Here students study from 1st through 5th grade.

A combined middle school and high school is located at Rua Pernambuco, 880 (Savassi neighborhood). Here students study the 6th through 9th grade before advancing to the high school.

Student Council

The St. Anthony's Student Council is very active and is supported by the principals and teachers. During election periods, the Council organises awareness-raising campaigns for students, promoting debates between candidates for elective office and inviting judges of the Regional Electoral Court (_Tribunal Regional Eleitoral de Minas Gerais_) to give lectures.

In the cultural sector, the Council and its Department of Internal Affairs develop projects such as “Debate Theatre” and “Reading the Classics”. The Council also promotes the Festival of Bands at recess time. Students vote for the best bands and the winners get to play in the “Ice Cream Festival”, which is also sponsored by the Council.

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[2] About Colégio Santo Antônio. Retrieved October 21, 2019.

[3] Colégio Santo Antônio recebe selo da Unesco, _Estado de Minas_. Retrieved October 21, 2019.

[4] Apenas 19 escolas de Minas promovem valores da Unesco, _O Tempo_. Retrieved October 21, 2019.

[5] Ranking das 20 melhores escolas no ENEM 2008. _Mundo Vestibular_. Retrieved November 29, 2019.

title: Colégio Santo Antônio

question: Summarize the history of Colégio Santo Antônio.

answer: Colégio Santo Antônio was established at São João del Rei, Minas Gerais, on May 1, 1909. It distinguished itself as a benchmark of education, welcoming students from all over the country. In the late 1940s, the school was moved to Belo Horizonte, the state capital, to better prepare students for the Federal University of Minas Gerais.

critique: The answer should mention the school's activities in the 1950s.

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question: Summarize a typical student's education at Colégio Santo Antônio.

answer: Students take classes in guitar, violin, flute, ballet, jazz, folk dancing, soccer, handball, volleyball, and basketball. The school also has three choirs and an experimental orchestra.

critique: The answer should mention the grades the students are in.

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question: What does the text say about Colégio Santo Antônio's Student Council?

answer: The St. Anthony's Student Council is very active and is supported by the principals and teachers. During election periods, the Council organizes awareness-raising campaigns for students, promoting debates between candidates for elective office and inviting judges of the Regional Electoral Court to give lectures. In the cultural sector, the Council and its Department of Internal Affairs develop projects such as "Debate Theatre" and "Reading the Classics". The Council also promotes the Festival of Bands at recess time. Students vote for the best bands and the winners get to play in the "Ice Cream Festival", which is also sponsored by the Council.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: "the Council and its Department of Internal Affairs develop projects such as “Debate Theatre” and “Reading the Classics”." - this is incorrect. This should be "the Council and its Department of Internal Affairs develop projects such as “Debate Theatre” and “Reading the Classics”."

question: Summarize the effect the Order of Friars Minor has had on Colégio Santo Antônio.

answer: The school was established by the Order of Friars Minor in 1909. The Order of the Friars Minor founded the school in 1209. The school belongs to the Province of Santa Cruz, which is an internal division of the Order of the Friars Minor. The Order of the Friars Minor has had a great influence on the school and its operations.

critique: The first line is irrelevant to the question

critique: The school was founded in 1909, not 1209.


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Two Chinese banks now provide as much international development finance as the next six biggest multilateral lenders combined but are greatly exposed to political, social and environmental risks, new research says.

In almost doubling the global capital base available for development projects, China has enabled developing countries with less access to international finance to bridge gaping infrastructure and energy shortfalls, according to a study by Boston University’s Global Economic Governance Initiative and the Chinese Academy of Social Sciences.

“Such a stepwise increase arrives just in time,” the paper says, pointing out that Western multilateral Development Banks (MDBs) appear to be stagnating in expanding their portfolios.

China Development Bank and the Export-Import Bank of China (CHEXIM) together lent some US$684 billion between 2007 and the end of 2014. The next six biggest lenders, which include the World Bank, the Japanese-led Asian Development Bank and the Inter-American Development Bank, are owed US$700 billion. During the same period, China’s policy banks increased energy-related finance to national governments by US$117 billion, representing a two-fold increase in the total amount.

Yet despite the impressive figures, China’s loan portfolio is subject to considerable risks. With 66% of energy-related finance concentrated in coal-fired power, the associated costs of these loans, known as externalities, are a real concern.

“Using conservative estimates of the climate and local health costs of coal plant emissions, we calculate that the yearly social costs [the health costs of increased pollution plus the costs associated with social conflicts] of Chinese overseas coal-fired power plants amounts to US$29.7 billion,” the report’s authors say.

Furthermore, the ability of countries to service their debt to China – which is often repaid with commodities such as coal and oil – is threatened by fluctuating market prices.

In order to curb emissions and reduce risk, China should diversify its investment portfolio towards cleaner energy projects, the report says. Doing so would also help bring China’s overseas investments in line with international sustainable development goals.

RISKS

While China has lent to borrowers who face difficulty accessing finance from elsewhere, this has drastically increased its exposure to economic downturns in recipient countries, which impact their ability to repay loans.

Venezuela, whose troubled president Nicolás Maduro recently announced a 60-day state of emergency, is currently in debt to China to the tune of US$65 billion. The Venezuelan government recently announced it had negotiated better repayment terms with China, saying the move “gave oxygen” to an oil-dependent economy asphyxiated by the crash in global prices.

A number of other countries to which China has lent significantly for energy projects are considered high risk by the Organization of Economic Co-operation and Development (OECD). Ethiopia, Niger, Sudan, Pakistan and Bosnia & Herzegovina all rank alongside Venezuela as the most risky destinations for China’s energy investments.

Argentina also features in this group but the election of pro-market president Mauricio Macri has led to a downgrading of the country’s risk rating by other agencies.

Only marginally less risky is Ecuador, which defaulted on its sovereign debt in 2008 and has since borrowed upwards of US$8 billion from Chinese banks for energy projects.

In addition to the risk of non-repayment, the consequences of exacerbating climate change by increasing carbon emissions are almost inestimable. The study estimates that the coal-fired power plants included in China’s overseas investment portfolio emit 594 million metric tonnes of CO2 annually, equivalent to 11% of US total annual emissions and 6% of China’s.

Furthermore, China’s financing of coal overseas is increasingly out of step with its domestic policies as consumption at home has fallen for two consecutive years, according to China’s National Bureau of Statistics.

Experts predict China will reduce its current over-supply of coal by around one billion tonnes this year as it attempts to bring CO2 emissions in line with commitments made under the Paris Agreement.

Environmental campaigners recently told _chinadialogue_ that curbing coal at home whilst promoting it abroad was “hypocritical”.

RENEWABLES

China devotes 28% of its total energy finance to renewable energy, whereas the MDB's allocate an average 88%. However, these figures include hydropower projects, which have major environmental consequences.

Scarcely 1% of China’s development finance goes to non-hydro renewables. The MDBs invest 27%.

Given the high proportion of investments in coal and hydropower, shifting investments to cleaner technologies represents a big challenge for China’s big policy banks and 13 new regional development funds.

Nonetheless, China’s emergence as major player in international development finance and within new multilateral development banks means it is “uniquely placed” to steer the transition to a low-carbon economy.

“This finance is very welcome and could not come at a better time,” the report says.

question: Summarize the steps being taken in support of environmentalism.

answer: China devotes 28% of its total energy finance to renewable energy, whereas the MDBs allocate an average 88%. However, these figures include hydropower projects, which have major environmental consequences. Scarcely 1% of China’s development finance goes to non-hydro renewables. The MDBs invest 27%.

critique: It is not made clear how the percentages are achieved, as they are not calculated by the report. The answer should list the energy sector that the bulk of China's energy finance is invested in at the moment.

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critique: The answer should mention that China is uniquely placed to steer the transition to a low-carbon economy.

question: Summarize the article's criticisms of China.

answer: The article points to China's increased lending of coal fired power as a reason to lower its exposure to it. Also, a risk to China's massive loans is being repaid with commodities, a risky prospect given fluctuations in the market. In addition, the article claims that China's investment in coal is at odds with its domestic environmental policies as it has recently fallen for two consecutive years. There is also concern about the environmental impact of hydropower investment.

critique: "The article points to China's increased lending of coal fired power as a reason to lower its exposure to it." - the article doesn't say anything about China's lending. It only says that China's loan portfolio is subject to considerable risks. The answer should be rewritten.

critique: The article does not criticize China for its hydropower investment.

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text: It is omitted that scarcely 1% of China’s development finance goes to non-hydro renewables.

question: What does the article say about Japan's contributions to CO2 emissions?

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critique: The answer should reflect that no information on CO2 emissions is given in the passage.

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question: Summarize everything relating to alternative energy sources.

answer: China devotes 28% of its total energy finance to renewable energy, whereas the MDBs allocate an average 88%. However, these figures include hydropower projects, which have major environmental consequences. Scarcely 1% of China’s development finance goes to non-hydro renewables. The MDBs invest 27%.

critique: The answer does not mention that the report suggests China should diversify its investment portfolio towards cleaner energy projects.

critique: The answer should mention that the report recommends China shift its investments to cleaner energy sources.

critique: The answer should mention that the author recommends China shift its investments to cleaner technologies.

critique: Renewable non-hydro options are missing.

critique: The MDBs allocate 88% of their energy finance to renewables, but only 27% of their total energy finance.

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A TEAM OF STUDENTS AT THE UNIVERSITY OF LIVERPOOL ARE ABOUT TO BEGIN TESTING WHAT THEY HOPE WILL BE THE FASTEST MAN POWERED BIKE ON THE PLANET - USING 30 VOLUNTEERS TO FIND THE PERFECT PILOT.

The team of engineers hope to beat the current speed record for a human-powered vehicle which currently stands at 83.13mph. The team hope to beat this by as much as 7 per cent.

Patrick Harper, lead ergonomics engineer and commercial manager of the University of Liverpool’s Velocipede Team (ULV), told the Liverpool Echo: “We’re looking for our engine, someone who can power our machine.

“Ideally it would be someone with a small body and powerful legs, but finding someone like that is very difficult.

“We’ll be taking measurements of them all, making sure of their height and the width of their hips and their shoulders because we will be tailoring the bike around them.”

The testing regime for the volunteers includes a Peak Power test, followed by a Wingate test and then a Ramp test, in which the exercise bike’s resistance is increased across a 15-20 minute period.

One or two riders will be chosen from a shortlist to accompany the bike to the World Human Power Speed Challenge (WHPSC) in Battle Mountain, Nevada in September 2015.

Patrick added: “It’s brilliant, we all love it. A couple of us worked flat out through the summer just to keep the project going because we are so passionate about it.

“We knew we would have to do that work to make sure we get there in September.”

If the eight engineering students succeed, they’ll bring the record to the UK for the first time. The current record was set in September last year by a team of students from the Delft University of Technology and VU University of Amsterdam.

“This is the first time that the University of Liverpool have attempted this exciting project and the team and I have been overwhelmed by the positive response we have received at this early stage of our journey,” said team leader Ben Hogan.

“We are extremely excited about attending the 2015 event and having the opportunity to showcase the UK’s innovation for sustainable transport on an international stage.”

ULVTeam say that the rider will be lying in a recumbent position just five inches from the ground inside a carbon-fibre shell, and will need to generate over 700 watts of power. They have partnered with Far-UK Composites, a Nottingham-based company that specialises in lightweight structural composite components, for the project.

The unusual shape that completely encloses the vehicle’s framework is, of course, designed with aerodynamics in mind. The team aren’t yet saying whether the rider will be using a windscreen or relying on a camera to see out of the shell.

Last month we reported how Scottish cycling legend Graeme Obree is working on a new version of Beastie, the bike he used for his human powered vehicle speed record attempt last September – but it will be his son, Jamie, who aims to ride it in Nevada next year and beat the prone world record of 56.62mph his father set.

Jamie went to Battle Mountain for the International Human Powered Vehicle Association (IHPVA) World Human Powered Speed Challenge last year, and was hoping to have a crack himself on Beastie – but his father said the bike, in which he faced forward, lying on his chest, was not stable enough, reports The Herald.

Now Obree is working on a new version of the self-built bike and hopes that his 20-year-old son, who is studying to be either a nurse or paramedic, can take his record from him.

question: What does the text say about human-powered vehicles?

answer: Human-powered vehicles are vehicles that are powered by humans. The current speed record for a human-powered vehicle stands at 83.13 mph. The team of engineers hope to beat this by as much as 7 percent. The testing regime for the volunteers includes a Peak Power test, followed by a Wingate test and then a Ramp test.

critique: The answer should mention the University of Liverpool's human-powered vehicle.

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critique: It is omitted that the University of Liverpool is attempting to build the fastest human-powered vehicle.

critique: The answer should mention the University of Liverpool's Velocipede Team.

critique: Remove the first part, as that is more of a semantic understanding of the answer and specific to the question. Then, combine the last two sentences about the tests.

critique: It is omitted that the current speed record was set by a team of students from the Delft University of Technology and VU University of Amsterdam.

question: What does the text say about the testing process?

answer: The project to build the bike involved 30 volunteers and a series of tests. Volunteers were given Peak Power test and Wingate test. The ramp test involved the exercise bike's resistance would be increased across a 15-20 minute period.

critique: The answer should mention that the volunteers were tested for their power.

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critique: The instructions to the test should be mentioned to complete the picture.

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question: What does the text say about general testing procedures?

answer: The testing regime for the volunteers includes a Peak Power test, followed by a Wingate test and then a Ramp test. The exercise bike's resistance is increased across a 15-20 minute period.

critique: The response misses to mention that the Peak Power test measures the power output of the volunteer.

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question: What does the text say about Graeme Obree?

answer: Graeme Obree is a Scottish cycling legend who is working on a new version of Beastie, the bike he used for his human-powered vehicle speed record attempt last September. His son, Jamie, is hoping to ride it in Nevada next year and beat the prone world record of 56.62mph his father set.

critique: Jamie is still in school and is not yet a nurse or paramedic.

critique: It is omitted that Graeme Obree worked with his son, Jamie, to modify his bike Beastie.

critique: The answer should mention that Graeme's bike was not stable enough.

critique: The answer should mention that Graeme's son is studying to be a nurse or paramedic.

critique: Graeme Obree is not a Scottish cycling legend.

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JONAH PIʻIKOI (January, 1804 – April 26, 1859), also spelled IONA PIʻIKOI, was a Hawaiian high chief and served as a statesman during the Kingdom of Hawaii.

Life

According to Piʻikoi himself, he was born in the month of _Ikuwā,_ around January 1804, at Waimea on the island of Kauaʻi. Piʻikoi's parents were Kawahinemakua and Kiko. He was a _kaukau aliʻi,_ of lower-ranking chiefly descent, but a relative of the Kings of Kauaʻi. His great-grandmother Kahalemanuolono was the sister of Kamakahelei, making Piʻikoi a distant cousin of King Kaumualiʻi of Kauaʻi. His Hawaiian name Piʻikoi translate as “lofty aspirations.”

Piʻikoi began public service as a tobacco lighter of King Kaumualiʻi and later King Kamehameha II. He accompanied Kamehameha II to Oʻahu in 1822, serving as his personal attendant. Returning to Kauaʻi after Kamehameha II's departure to Great Britain, Piʻikoi assisted the newly appointed Governor Kahalaiʻa Luanuʻu in suppressing Humehume's rebellion in 1824.[1] Returning to Oʻahu, he served Kahalaiʻa until his death in 1826 and afterward became a servant of Kamehameha III. Piʻikoi became a _konohiki_ or land agent for Kamehameha III's lands on Oʻahu and gain much profit from managing the land. During the Great Māhele, he was given the duty of separating the King's land from that of the chiefs' He would later serve in the House of Nobles 1845–1859 and on the Privy Council 1852–1855.[2]

Piʻikoi died at his Fort street residence in Honolulu, on April 26, 1859. He was in his fifties and his cause of death was described as aneurysm of the aorta.[3][4] Before his death, he wrote an autobiography _Sketch of J. Piikoi's Life_ which was published by the _Pacific Commercial Advertiser_ on May 12, 1859.[5] His funeral was dated to May 16 and buried in a family tomb near his country residence on the plains of Kewalo.[6][7]

Piʻikoi Street in Honolulu is named after either him or his son. He once owned a large section of around the area where, the land between Waikiki and Honolulu, called the Kewalo area. Piʻikoi built the first two-story wooden house in Kewalo, which is now near the President William McKinley High School.

Marriage and children

Piʻikoi's first wife was Kekahili, daughter of Kamokuiki, and half-sister of High Chief Kapaʻakea. With Kekahili, he had High Chief David Kahalepouli Piʻikoi, the father of David Kawānanakoa, Edward Abnel Keliʻiahonui, and Jonah Kūhiō Kalanianaʻole, who shared his grandfather's Christian name.

His second wife Kamakeʻe (died 1871) was the daughter of Ihu and Keʻekapu.[8] They had two daughters: Lydia (Lilia) Piʻikoi (died 1900) and Maria (Maraea) Piʻikoi (1848–1874). Lydia married three times, to William S. Wond, John Ena and Samuel K. Kamakaia, and her only son was William Piʻikoi Wond (1864–1887), a member of the Royal Hawaiian Band.[9] Lydia's obituary in 1900 called her a daughter of Kekahili instead.[10][11] Maria was married to Thomas Jefferson Cummins, half-brother of John Adams Cummins, and had three daughters: Lydia Kekaulike Cummins, Elizabeth Kamakeʻe Cummins, and Maria Maiopili Cummins. After Piʻikoi's death, his widow Kamakeʻe remarried to W. P. Kamakau.[12]

An unnamed daughter died in the 1848 measles epidemic.

Family tree

[Grandsons of Jonah Piʻikoi at San Mateo. Left to right: Kalanianaʻole, Kawānanakoa and Keliʻiahonui]

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title: Jonah Piʻikoi

question: Summarize Pi'ikoi's public service career.

answer: Pi'ikoi began public service as a tobacco lighter of King Kaumuali'i and later King Kamehameha II. He accompanied Kamehameha II to Oahu in 1822, serving as his personal attendant. Returning to Kauai after Kamehameha II's departure to Great Britain, Pi'ikoi assisted the newly appointed Governor Kahalai'a Luanu'u in suppressing Humehume's rebellion in 1824. He served Kahalai'a until his death in 1826 and afterward became a servant of Kamehameha III. Pi'ikoi became a konohiki or land agent for Kamehameha III's lands on Oahu and gain much profit from managing the land. During the Great Mahele, he was given the duty of separating the King's land from that of the chiefs'. He would later serve in the House of Nobles 1845-1859 and on the Privy Council 1852-1855.

critique: The first sentence is a bit confusing and can be rephrased for better clarity.

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critique: The answer should mention Pi'ikoi's role in the Great Mahele.

question: Summarize Pi'ikoi's legacy.

answer: Pi'ikoi was a high chief and served as a statesman during the Kingdom of Hawaii. Pi'ikoi's Hawaiian name Pi'ikoi translates as "lofty aspirations". Pi'ikoi built the first two-story wooden house in Kewalo and owned a large section of land where Waikiki and Honolulu are now. Pi'ikoi Street in Honolulu is named after him or his son. Pi'ikoi was married twice and had a total of seven children.

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question: Summarize Pi'ikoi's marriages and children.

answer: His first wife was Kekahili, daughter of Kamokuiki, and half-sister of High Chief Kapa'akea. They had High Chief David Kahalepouli Pi'ikoi, the father of David Kawananakoa, Edward Abnel Keli'iahonui, and Jonah Kūhiō Kalaniana'ole, who shared his grandfather's Christian name. His second wife was Kamake'e, the daughter of Ihu and Ke'ekapu. They had two daughters, Lydia (Lilia) Pi'ikoi, who died in 1900, and Maria (Maraea) Pi'ikoi, who died in 1874. An unnamed daughter died in the 1848 measles epidemic.

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ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCE is shaking up the broadcasting landscape and media & entertainment industry. Players, both big and small, are racing to leverage AI to differentiate their services from the rest. The research around the technology has been extensive and the investments are in billions. AI is one primary factor that helps marketers identify their customers and realize their needs. By knowing individual needs, marketers foray into the territory of personalization and there, the concept of content branding originates. Personalization of products/services is becoming table stakes to stay relevant in this competitive industry.
Artificial intelligence (AI), as we know, is a branch of computer science that aims at creating intelligent technology capable of replicating human learning and problem-solving skills. OTT industry is largely betting on Artificial Intelligence and new technologies to garner that 30-crucial-seconds of attention of their target customers. With the booming success of OTT giants such as Netflix, Amazon Prime, Hulu, etc., media companies have realized the changing consumer interest, viewing habits, viewing pattern, preferences of genre etc. to be key factors for success. And in order to have a hold on these, they are not shying away to invest moolah in Artificial Intelligence and data which according to them makes them future-ready.
A GLANCE AT COGNITIVE COMPUTING

Cognitive computing allows learning and building knowledge from various structured and unstructured data. According to a survey, 86% of Media and Entertainment executives who are familiar with cognitive computing believe it will play a disruptive role in the industry. However, the broadcasting industry must smartly handle the data. Advances in cognitive computing narrow the gap between data quantity and data insights. It certainly helps to enhance the cognitive processes of professionals and betters the decision-making process.
ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCE IS HERE TO STAY!

To start with, it’s not a news anymore that the trailer of the 20th Century Fox horror flick, Morgan was developed using machine learning which is often interchangeably used for AI though there is a thin line of difference between the two. A total of six minutes of footage were pulled from the 90-minute movie, resulting in a 24-hour process, from start to finish whereas normally a film’s trailer development process takes weeks to complete. It is just a small example how powerful can AI be if data insights are acutely studied and implemented.
In the 2017 US Open, IBM’s cognitive computing platform Watson assembled a clip reel within five minutes of the end of every match, churning out highlights and key moments available to fans 2 to 10 hours faster than previous years. The event which marked the official launch of IBM Watson Media is a new venture that leverages Watson’s AI capabilities to meet the future needs of broadcasters and their audiences. Watson analyzed 320 hours of video from the event to find the most exciting moments. It also consumed statistical information from courtside devices used to measure ball position, serve speed and other technical dimensions.
Coming back to OTT arena, streaming giant Netflix uses AI extensively. From suggesting better content depending on viewing preferences to optimizing video compression and delivery, Netflix’s familiarity with AI for improved viewing experience is nothing new. Content management can greatly benefit from AI technology as image, emotion, and voice recognition have empowered media technology purchasers to increasingly rely on AI tools to organize and search content archives. Similarly, AI can also help in tagging content (which is an expensive affair). With detailed metadata, search on content management systems has become more precise thereby encouraging monetization opportunities. AI, also termed as “cognitive intelligence” in broadcasting industry promises to track individual customer consumption habits.

Take a look at the Broadcasting Landscape in 2018
HOW NETFLIX SAVED $1 BILLION A YEAR BY LEVERAGING AI?

Netflix claimed in the past that its AI-powered recommendations save up to $1 billion a year by decreasing churn. The usage of Dynamic Optimizer by Netflix helps to compress codecs and optimize network data transfers. In addition to this Artificial Intelligence optimizes the over-the-top (OTT) delivery by preventing congested links and unstable connectivity with the adoption of internet protocol (IP).
Microsoft, Amazon, Google etc. have cloud-based video delivery channels. Here, AI plays an important role in scalability. The cloud services of the aforementioned companies have a substantial amount elasticity which in simple terms means the ability to increase or decrease available resources as needed. Artificial Intelligence is used to predict the increase in resource requirements with an aim to reduce the delaying.

ONLINE STREAMING INDUSTRY STAYS ABUZZ OVER ARTIFICIAL INTELLIGENCE

In the last two NAB Shows – 2018 & 2019 events held in Las Vegas, the industry experts talked about the role of Artificial Intelligence (AI) and Immersive Media in the upcoming years. The world’s largest electronic media showed how streaming and online video connoisseurs gather and exchange thoughts about the cutting-edge technology that is redefining the curation, channelization, and delivery of content on any platform. And as per recent reports, Artificial Intelligence and Machine Learning will be a trending topic in future years as the crowd from broadcasting, media, entertainment, and technology will assemble to throw light on the changing dimension of streaming media, its effect on the peripheral industry and above all consumer behavior.

This year, Muvi is exhibiting at the Broadcast Asia Singapore 2019. Come and be a part of the convention. Book a Meeting now.

question: Why is AI considered essential in helping companies survive a competitive market in the entertainment business?

answer: All gameplay and written content is reliant on the needs of the viewer.

critique: The article makes no mention of video games.

critique: This response is not fully accurate as it could consider games and written content.

critique: The answer is not related to the question.


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Jason Hunnicutt is the owner of 1904 Music Hall in Jacksonville, FL. The venue was founded in 20011 with the goal to bring live music to Downtown Jacksonville. The bar itself was first built in 1904, from which they got their name. 1904 Music Hall is a 300 capacity venue that books national touring artists in all genres. Prior to opening 1904 Music Hall, Jason was a touring musician himself, and has always been entrepreneurial spirited.

I first had the opportunity to work with Jason Hunnicutt in March of 2016, when I brought Bonerama from New Orleans, LA to Jacksonville. From the first day, working with Jason wasbreath of fresh air. Unfortunately it’s always a toss up when working with venue owners. You never know what you’re going to get. Some owners are open minded and easy to work with, and are open to outside promoters, some have absolutely no clue what they’re doing, others are extremely disorganized, you have your control freaks, and also some with bigger egos than the artists themselves. It’s really nice when you have the opportunity to work with a venue owner that’s open minded, easy to work with, and someone that has a really great attitude. I saw that from day one with Jason, and since we’ve worked together on New Kingston, The Steppin Stones, and Zach Deputy. And I’m sure there will be many more names to add to that list down the road.

HIGHLIGHTS FROM THIS EPISODE
What made Jason want to open the venue in Jacksonville (06:18)
How Jacksonville is branded (08:50)
The bands who inspired Jason (12:35)
Cool venues Jason experienced while touring (18:20)
What lit Jason’s entrepreneurial spark (20:40)
Risks involved in opening Venue 1904 (25:00)
How Jason and partners found their venue location (27:00)
The work put into remodeling 1904 (29:30)
Big surprises and learning experiences (35:37)
Aspiring venue owner advice. (37:39)
How Jason knew Venue 1904 was in a good place. (40:10)
Making it to Jason Hunnicutt (42:15)

QUOTES FROM JASON HUNNICUTT
“The band is your own business.”
“Once you get one going, the second one is easier.”
“Three is a good number for partners.”
“Keeping the consistency, it’s hard starting a business and the first few months are always the hardest. “
“Say ‘yes’, man!”
“Commit to it.”
“Say yes and be open, kind of to everything.”
“As much as you think your musical is taste great, and as much as you think you know what people want to hear and experience, it’s really up to community that is supporting you.”
“Seeing the positive reviews from the community and the bands too. I think when that started happening I was like ‘Cool!’ “

LINKS TO PEOPLE, PLACES, AND THINGS MENTIONED
PEOPLE
Kevin Stone
Allman Brothers Band
Lynyrd Skynyrd

PLACES & THINGS
Jacksonville
Florida Theatre
1904 Music Hall
One Spark Festival
The Elbow
Limp Bizkit
Korn
Pink Floyd
Led Zeppelin
Floozies
Main Squeeze
Lettuce
The Imperial
Jack Rabbits
Suwanee Fest
The Engine Room
Urban Organics
Underbelly

JASON HUNNICUTT’S DEFINITION OF MAKING IT:
“The key to a business: Doing a hustle and then training someone to do that hustle; Being able to pay them to do that hustle and also being able to pay yourself. -Ian Ranne” – Jason Hunnicutt

question: What are the positive qualities of a venue owner, and which ones does Jason Hunnicutt possess?

answer: He is a supportive business partner and confident decision-maker. He takes initiative and solves problems creatively. He is organized and is not afraid to delegate. He is committed to seeing his place reach its full potential and to working with other business owners in supporting each other's endeavours. He is aware of his capabilities and limitations and knows when to ask for help.

critique: Sounds a lot like the narrator's opinion than Jason's qualities. I would delete this.

critique: "and is aware of his capabilities and limitations" is an unnecessary detail

critique: The answer is made up and doesn't really say anything about Jason.

critique: This is not a quality of a venue owner. The question is about Jason, not other possible owners.

text: Sentence 3 isn't said in the text. It should be omitted.

question: What does the article say about how to book a venue for a concert?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the article doesn't say anything about booking a venue for a concert.

critique: The article does not answer the question.

critique: No response is given, which is an adequate answer to the question and should be affirmed.


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critique: The answer should be "No answer" because the question is unanswered in the text.

critique: No answer is given, but the text does mention personal fitness programming.

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critique: The article does not address the topic of personal fitness programming specifically, the general features with regard to managing the fitness studios seem to replicate those features found in other studio management systems.

critique: There is no mention of personal fitness programming in the text.

critique: No answer given, but omitted mention of personal fitness programming.

critique: It's omitted that StudioBookings is not a personal fitness programming solution.

question: Summarize the methods the text uses to convince its readers to buy the StudioBookings software.

answer: There is straightforward description of the benefits of the software, followed by personal testimonials from users who believe StudioBookings is the best solution. The text also includes a list of its features, along with its pricing.

critique: The answer should mention the use of testimonials.

critique: The answer omits the StudioBookings' pricing.

critique: The details about the testimonials and list of StudioBookings features are critical in convincing readers to buy the software.

critique: It is omitted that the testimonials are from other studio owners.

critique: The answer misses to mention that the testimonials are from studios that used a number of other software before using StudioBookings.

critique: The answer is missing the most essential part to convince readers to buy the software, which is the testimonials.

critique: It misses to mention the fact that the testimonials are also posted as an example of the StudioBookings interface.

critique: The answer should mention the free trial.

critique: The narrator also encourages potential customers to try them out for 14 days without a credit card.

critique: "The text also includes a list of its features" is irrelevant

critique: The answer should mention that the text also includes a list of its features, along with its pricing.

critique: The answer could include that the testimonials are from real studios.


text:
"Jonathan" I said, sitting down on the third stair, looking across the room where he was seated on the couch, already watching ESPN despite the early hour.

"Can you give me a ride to the airport?"

The tears that had been threatening to escape for hours finally spilled over. Jonathan's eyes widened in disbelief.

"Yeah, I mean...You're leaving? Are you sure? Maybe if you just give it more time -- Does Jason know you're leaving?"

I thought about Jason sitting at his computer only a few minutes before, dressed crisply in slacks and a white shirt, ready for his first day as a substitute teacher.

My heart was full, but all I'd managed to say was, "Good luck! Have a great day!"

I drank him in, knowing it would be the last time I ever saw him.

Returning my attention to Jonathan, I murmered, "No, I didn't tell him. But I can't live like this anymore. I'm going crazy."

Jonathan's eyes met mine and understanding flowed between us. I didn't need to mention the sleepless nights spent waiting for my soul mate to return home from wherever he had been. Or the conversations, just audible, from behind closed doors. Jon had been there too.

We arrived at the airport at the exact moment my flight was set to depart. I hugged Jonathan tightly, realizing this to be another forever goodbye. Even though Jonathan was Jason's friend first, he'd also been a wonderful friend to me.

"I know I'm late, but you have to let me on another flight," I begged the attendant through my tears. I was drowning.

She took in my pathetic appearance and was more sympathetic than I could have hoped for, finding me a flight a few hours later at no extra charge. I gave her my shaky thanks.

Sitting at the gate, hours early, I had nothing to do other than watch the time steadily advance to 3:30, when Jason would be arriving home from work. Soon he would see my room, now devoid of personal belongings. Then, in a state of confusion, he would walk down the hall to his room, where he would find the letter I'd left on his bed.

I waited for Jason to call. I knew that if he asked me to, I'd stay. However, the minutes ticked by -- now it was 3:45, and now 4:00 -- and his call never came.

To distract myself, I called my friend, Jonni.

"I'm here," I said dully, "I'm waiting for my plane."

"I'm proud of you," Jonni's voice was strong, like her.

"How do you feel? Do you think you made the right decision?"

"I don't know," I replied, "But there's nothing I can do about it now. Jason's going to be so upset."

Again, the tears came. A man in a business suit sitting nearby glanced at me uncomfortably before moving to a new seat. I was crying more today than I had in the near-decade that I had known Jason. This was really the end.

I put on headphones and chose to listen to a playlist on my headphones
IPod entitled "The Women I Love." It seemed like a safe choice, given that Jason didn't share my interest in female Anericana singers.

After only a few songs, however, I was confronted with The Dixie Chicks' cover of "Sweet Baby James." It was a painful reminder of Camp Taconic. After only a few summers, camp had become my true home. I loved so many people there, but what really made camp wonderful was that Jason and I ran science classes together. Now I didn't know what would happen.

This final realization really hit home. I sobbed with abandon. Great, shuddering cries that incorporated my entire body.

I hated Jason. Even more, I hated myself for not seeing through the lies he'd been telling me for years. For not being the person he wanted or needed. Not being enough. I was nothing, and this would never feel better.

After collecting my luggage in the Moline airport, I allowed myself to cry one final time while waiting for my mother to pick me up.

I was in Illinois, not Arizona. Jason was so many miles away that he no longer felt real. It seemed impossible that just this morning he had been at arm's length. I wondered fleetingly if I had simply imagined the nightmares of the past few months.

My betrayal was irrevocable now. The punishment was this vast, ugly space where my friends were still false, and this desperate, gaping emptiness identical to the one I'd tried to leave behind in Phoenix that still loomed in my heart.

title: [NF] April 6, 2009

question: Why does the narrator need a ride to the airport?

answer: She tells her boyfriend, Jason, that she is taking a flight to Illinois to stay with her mom, even though she believes he has been unfaithful.

critique: The narrator is not going to Illinois to stay with her mom. She is going to Illinois to escape her boyfriend.

text: The narrator doesn't tell her boyfriend anything. This should be omitted.

question: What does the narrator hope will happen when Jason gets back from work?

answer: She hopes Jason will see that she's gone and ask her to stay.

critique: "She hopes Jason will see that she's gone and ask her to stay." - the narrator is a woman.

critique: The narrator doesn't hope Jason will ask her to stay. She hopes he will call her.

critique: The narrator is not hoping that Jason will ask her to stay. She is hoping that he will call her.

text: The narrator doesn't necessarily hope for anything with Jason. She expects things will happen, like reading the letter or calling her.


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Local musicians are on a mission to put Cincinnati's music history on the map, one craft cocktail at a time.

CINCINNATI -- History can be told in a myriad of ways, but for two local musicians, they're banking on your taste buds.

Maya Banatwala and Kristen Kreft are on a mission to put Cincinnati's music history on the map, one craft cocktail at a time. The longtime bartenders created a recipe book of dozens of cocktails inspired from local musicians past and present or those with ties to the Queen City.

"Cincinnati is a Mecca of music history," Kreft said. "We’re right here in the middle of the Midwest where all music worlds collide. Country music, soul music, R&B, Blues, Funk music. It all kind of originated right here. We’ve got King Records, Fraternity Records, Jewel Records."

They first came up with the idea for their book, titled "Rocktails: An Amped Up Spin on Mixology," while working together as bartenders for many years together at Japp's in Over-the-Rhine.

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Kristen Kreft and Maya Banatwala have come up with dozens of craft cocktail recipes for their book based on Cincinnati's music history. Emily Maxwell | WCPO

“Being musicians, we both kept coming up with cocktail lists that represented music in the area," Banatwala said. "Every time we worked together we kept saying, 'We have to write a book!' and also honor musicians in Cincinnati through cocktails because that’s what we like to make."

Banatwala and Kreft are no strangers to Cincinnati's music scene. Banatwala is the front woman of local rock group Heavy Hingesand Kreft, a well-known vocalist who helps several local bands and artists, is founder of popular group The Perfect Children. (Side note: Both groups perform at Ironfest this Saturday at the Southgate House Revival in Newport, Kentucky.)

The pair spent the past year compiling stories and interviewing local musicians and DJs for inspiration for their recipes. As part of that process, they held several fundraisers where they tested their creations through special pop-up events at live-music bars like Listing Loon and Urban Artifact.

Some of those local acts included The All-Seeing Eyes, Cincinnati Knights, Quiet Lives, Darlene, Lung Carriers, Yusef Quotah, Andrew Jody, Brian Olive and more.

"We would hire a band, ask them to give us a list of their five favorite songs, read the lyrics, find a little history about the song and create a cocktail based on that moment," Kreft said.

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Kristen Kreft and Maya Banatwala hold up one of their signature cocktails at the Listing Loon. Emily Maxwell | WCPO

After a year had a passed they realized that they gathered enough material to create their first book. "Rocktails: An Amped Up Spin on Mixology," pays homage to the city's local scene. Each recipe has step-by-step instructions and a description of how they derived their inspiration. Some are takes on old classics, but all of them are new recipes that the pair designed.

Banatwala and Kreft have a second book in the works, called "Cincinnati Rocktails," set to publish in the next few months that will solely focus on Cincinnati icons or famous artists who got their start here, like Rosemary Clooney and Hank Ballard.

The Cincinnati natives hope their recipes bring awareness to their hometown's music heritage.

“We want to honor these iconic musicians, but we also want to honor Cincinnati," Kreft said. "And we kind of want the world to know that these musicians, Cincinnati played a giant role in their life. And what’s the best way we can do that is that we can make

question: Summarize the motivations behind Banatwala and Kreft's cocktail project.

answer: Banatwala and Kreft want to honor their hometown's music heritage. They hope their concoctions would bring awareness to the premiere of their hometown's role in the careers of iconic musicians and Cincinnati icons.

critique: The answer should mention that the pair want to honor the musicians through their cocktails.

critique: The answer omits the reason why Banatwala and Kreft want to honor their hometown's music heritage.

critique: Some of the musicians recognized in the book are ones that resided in Cincinnati.

critique: "Banatwala and Kreft want to honor their hometown's music heritage." - is incorrect. They want to honor Cincinnati's music heritage.

critique: "They hope their concoctions would bring awareness to the premiere of their hometown's role in the careers of iconic musicians and Cincinnati icons." - this is inaccurate. Banatwala and Kreft want to bring awareness to the music heritage of their hometown, not the premiere of it.

critique: "they hope their concoctions would bring awareness to the premiere of their hometown's role" - Change "their" to "Cincinnati's"

critique: The implication that the cocktails are named after the musicians is misleading.

critique: Banatwala and Kreft want to honor Cincinnati's music heritage.

critique: Banatwala and Kreft are not trying to bring awareness to the premiere of their hometown's role in the careers of iconic musicians and Cincinnati icons.

critique: The answer fails to include their fascination with music and how it is tied to their profession as bartenders.

critique: Banatwala and Kreft's hometown is also called Cincinnati.

critique: The answer is missing the motivation behind the project.

critique: The answer should mention that they want to honor the musicians through their cocktails.

question: What steps have Banatwala and Kreft taken to promote their upcoming book?

answer: They held fundraisers at bars in order to try their cocktails there. According to Kreft, some established musicians have contributed to their book. Presumably Banatwala and Kreft have won support because of the high quality of their first book "Rocktails" or because Kreft and Banatwala are established local artists.

critique: There is no evidence that established musicians have contributed to their book.

critique: The second line could be removed. They held fundraisers to test the cocktails they used to create their book.

critique: The answer conflates information from the text.

critique: "They held fundraisers at bars in order to try their cocktails there." - this is inaccurate because it was their pop-up events that they held.

critique: The answer is not relevant to the question.

critique: The answer is not related to the question.

critique: The answer is not clear and is not related to the question.

critique: This option is not mentioned in the article. This needs to be eliminated from the answer.

critique: Solution exploratory, without attributing the source of the information

critique: "They held fundraisers at bars in order to try their cocktails there." - this is inaccurate. The fundraisers were fundraisers for the musicians.

text: The last sentence is not supported

category: coherence

refinement: They held fundraisers at bars in order to try their cocktails there. According to Kreft, some established musicians have contributed to their book. Presumably Banatwala and Kreft have won support because of the high quality of their first book "Rocktails" or because Kreft and Banatwala are established local artists.