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“COLORS” (stylized as COLORS) is Utada Hikaru's 12th Japanese-language single (14th overall), and is the only single she released in 2003. It was released on January 29, 2003 and debuted at number one on the Oricon charts with 437,903 copies sold in the first week, and became her fifth single to achieve two consecutive weeks at the number one slot, a comparatively rare feat. Two versions were released, CD and DVD.

Included as CD-Extras on this single was a multimedia section containing 13 exclusive screensavers and 13 exclusive wallpapers. A special feature on the “Colors” DVD single is the Kanzou-sensei Report, which is a mini-documentary showing the production that went into the DVD, as well as behind-the-scenes shots of Utada working. This single reached number one on Oricon charts and charted for 45 weeks, her longest charting single ever. Though Kazuaki Kiriya was behind the art direction for the single, he did not take an active part as usual, with the single photography going to Kaoru Izima and the PV directing going to Donald Cameron. On the cover and the inside covers, there are drawings done by Utada herself (some designs include musical notation, the word 'yes' and a drawing of the Vatican). It became the third-best selling single of 2003 in Japan.

“Colors” had an extremely long performance season, which included 11 performances spanning over two months (except for the last performance, which was a special). This single reached number 27 on the World Charts for single airplay, and reached number six for sales. The most recent figures (May 25, 2006) show that the single sold 893,790 units in total.[1] The song featured heavy ethereal and experimental tones for the first time in Utada's discography. It became her longest charting single ever with a 45-week trajectory on the Oricon Singles chart, selling 881,000 copies, and was number three on the Yearly Singles chart.

“Colors” was performed during Utada's two date concert series _Wild Life_ in December 2010.[2]

Commercial tie-ins

Two special remixes of “Colors”, an orchestral version and “Colors” (Godson Mix) were produced to promote the Toyota WISH in Japan, Taiwan, Thailand and Malaysia. These remixes are not included on this single or any of her releases.

“Simple and Clean” was the theme song for the US releases of _Kingdom Hearts_, _Kingdom Hearts: Birth by Sleep_, and _Kingdom Hearts: Chain of Memories_ instead of “Hikari”.

Track listing

TV performances

-   [2003.01.12] CDTV
-   [2003.01.29] Viewsic
-   [2003.01.31] Music Station
-   [2003.02.05] Sokuhou Uta no Daijiten
-   [2003.02.06] Ax Music TV
-   [2003.02.08] Pop Jam
-   [2003.02.08] CDTV
-   [2003.02.13] Utaban
-   [2003.02.17] Hey! Hey! Hey!
-   [2003.03.03] SMAPxSMAP
-   [2003.12.17] Asahi Special

Charts

JAPAN (ORICON)

  Release                        Chart                        Peak position   Sales total   Chart run
  ------------------------------ ---------------------------- --------------- ------------- -----------
  January 29, 2003               Oricon Daily Singles Chart   1
  Oricon Weekly Singles Chart    1                            800,790         45
  Oricon Monthly Singles Chart   1
  Oricon Yearly Singles Chart    3

[1] Colors - Wiki.theppn

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title: Colors (Utada Hikaru song)

question: What does the text say about Utada Hikaru's song Colors?

answer: Colors is her 12th Japanese-language single and her only single that she released in 2003. She debuted it on the Oricon charts and sold 437, 903 copies in the first week. Colors is also the only single where she has been at the number one slot for two consecutive weeks. She achieved this feat four more times with her other singles. Colors also had an extremely long performance season, which lasted two months. The single reached number 27 on the World Charts for single airplay, and reached number six for sales. The single went on to sell 893,790 units in total.

critique: The first sentence is unnecessary and should be removed.

critique: "She debuted it on the Oricon charts and sold 437, 903 copies in the first week. Colors is also the only single where she has been at the number one slot for two consecutive weeks. She achieved this feat four more times with her other singles. Colors also had an extremely long performance season, which lasted two months. The single reached number 27 on the World Charts for single airplay, and reached number six for sales. The single went on to sell 893,790 units in total." - this is not relevant and should be deleted.

critique: The majority of the details in the response is inaccurate.

text: "Colors is also the only single where she has been at the number one slot for two consecutive weeks. She achieved this feat four more times with her other singles." - this is confusing and contradictory. It should be replaced with "Colors became her fifth single to achieve two consecutive weeks at the number one slot, a comparatively rare feat."

category: coherence

question: What does the text say about Utada Hikaru's life?

answer: No answer

critique: There is no answer, however, the text does mention her life.

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Escaping the Dream
The boy is trapped by nightmares and darkness. He can't escape.

At sunset, he climbs into his bed and dreams of lies, pain and death...

The putrid stench of dying, rotting flesh. Why? Why is life so pitiful? The ground is littered with death. The skies weep, tossing down puddles of endless misery. The red lake grows larger.

I toss and turn, but I stay still, possessed by a living nightmare. Beads of sweat accumulate on my forehead. I'm drowning. The water... It never stops. Make it stop. Stop!

Quiet. In the distance. Are those people? ...Demons. Run.

I'm one of them. How could this be? How could this happen?

The screams, the blood, the terror, pulsing through the veins of a thousand sleeping warriors all armored and ready for war. They watch, frozen like statues as clouds of dark mist cascade on their helpless bodies.

A lake of blood.

Did it end? Is it over? The covers. They strangle me. I'm choking. Get it off! Stop it! Get away!

The dark mist. It won't leave.

I fly over the blood stained hills, the water reflecting the gruesome battle. I'm flying? What am I? What have I become?

Listen. The sounds of wounded men.
Somebody help them!
But there's no time to waste.

The door opens. A cloaked figure silently glides to the bedside of a troubled boy and whispers in the dead of night.

No audible words.

The ritual begins.

No... The end is near. The ritual...  is already over.

What happened?

The boy awakens. He sees a man in a robe on his bedside. The man is talking.

The boy asks the man, "What happened? I'm scared."

"Well, son, Satan tried to scare my little warrior tonight, but he won't win."

"How do you know that?"
The boy had no comprehension of Satan, but he was troubled by the name regardless.

"Because I happen to be your father. I'm here to protect you, son."

The boy, comforted by the robed man, slowly glided back underneath the covers as the robed man tucked him in.

The boy, once asleep, dreamt about a wonderful place. Beautiful, winged creatures soared effortlessly through silky skies, emitting light on their journeys. Magnificent buildings flooded the golden streets, and joyous praises could be heard throughout.

The boy, guided by instinct, found and opened the door to his house.

The robed man, waiting for him through the door, took the boy's hand and guided him through marble stairways, high arches, and intricately detailed furnished rooms.

The boy, curious by the unworldly beauty of the place, outstretched his hands and delicately glided his small fingers across the walls in awe of the mysterious texture.

When the boy had satisfied his curiosity, the robed man took the boy's hand once again and led him outside.

They walked through the streets, observing the peculiar yet beautiful creatures that endlessly fluttered around the robed man.

As they approached closer to one of the creatures, the boy could hear an angelic voice resonating loudly from its mouth.

The creature spoke of a wonderful king who conquered death and defeated sin, but the boy had never heard those words before. He had no ability to comprehend the story that was being told, but he enjoyed listening to the voice nonetheless.

His eyes teared up, and his vision blurred. He wasn't scared, however. His mind rattled with love, hope, peace, and joy, emotions he had never experienced before.

The emotions, beautiful creatures, the golden streets and the perfect climate. Paradise. How could one long for anything else?

The boy peacefully awoke at sunrise. He hopped enthusiastically to the window and opened the blinds. His eyes caught the first glimpse of the sunrise in the distance, and he felt happy.

His hands touched the cold window, and he made a shape of a cross with his finger out of the condensation on the glass. It was a symbol he had never seen before, yet he felt so attached to it.

He felt like he was dreaming...

But he had escaped.

title:
Escaping the Dream
- A short story/free-verse poem I created. Constructive criticism is appreciated! Just please don't go overboard on swearing.

question: Explain the theme of the story.

answer: The theme of the story is that the boy is able to escape his dream.

critique: The answer should mention that the boy's nightmare is about demons and death.

critique: The answer should mention the Christian imagery.

critique: The answer should mention the father figure.

critique: The answer should mention that the boy escapes his dream through the help of his father.

critique: The theme is about spiritual warfare and the ability to overcome

critique: The boy escapes his dream, but the theme is more than that. The theme is the power of faith.

question: Summarize the conditions under which the boy began having these nightmares.

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the boy's father is Satan.

critique: The story does not answer this question, but it does provide some context.

critique: The response misses to provide a response to the instruction in the task.

question: Summarize the primary source of tension in the story.

answer: The primary source of tension in the story is the boy's nightmares. He is trapped in a living nightmare, and he can't escape. The boy is also possessed by a living nightmare.

critique: The boy is possessed by a living nightmare, not the primary source of tension.

critique: The boy is possessed by a living nightmare, not the primary source of tension in the story.

critique: The boy is possessed by a living nightmare, not a living nightmare.

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Living in Texas, my husband and I are huge football fans so naturally we love all things Dallas Cowboys and that includes watching “Dallas Cowboy Cheerleaders: Making The Team.” Now before you go rolling your eyes at our reality TV guilty pleasure, I want to share some serious personal branding lessons from this show that we can all learn from.

  But first a quick question: Do you know what your current personal brand even says about you? If you can’t answer this question quickly and confidently, you are not currently in control of your brand, and that could be hurting your future opportunities whether you work in the corporate world or have a business of your own.

  You may be saying to yourself right now, “But, I’m not a brand?!”, and I am here to tell you friend that nothing could not be further from the truth. If you have not been deliberate with building your personal brand, then what you have been doing is building a brand unaware of the impact you are not only making on other people, but your own reputation.

  What exactly is a personal brand? It’s your energy, your vibe. It’s that first impression you give when someone lands on your Facebook account. It’s everything from your appearance to the way you conduct yourself in a meeting, to how you treat the people around you.

  Jeff Bezos, founder and CEO of Amazon, defines a personal brand as “Your brand is what people say about you when you’re not in the room.”

  What has intrigued me about watching young women pursue their dreams of becoming a Dallas Cowboy cheerleader is how many of these young women while talented and have worked very hard to make a team of elite few are so unaware of how much their personal lives plays a role in whether or not they will land a job for an NFL team.

  Many of these young women are entering their final stages of making the cut; their dreams are just within reach when they are called into the Director’s office to explain their online activities. A simple search of their name has revealed explicit sexual photos, binge drinking on a college campus and public tweets that are distasteful and crude.

  One by one they are each informed that they will not continue on as a Dallas Cowboy cheerleader despite passing all other requirements because as a national brand and franchise, the Dallas Cowboys have a reputation to uphold and they can’t risk a Dallas Cowboy cheerleader’s past tarnishing their own brand.

  One by one they are dismissed and asked to clean out their lockers. One mistake. One moment of lapsed judgment stopped their dreams dead in their tracks. What a shame, right?

  What does a simple Google search reveal about you and your personal brand? What do potential clients or employers find when they search for your name? Have you been passed over for opportunities and didn’t even realize it?

Here are three ways your personal brand could be sabotaging your future opportunities:

1. Online Persona

Are you constantly complaining online about politics and voicing your opinion in a negative way about world events? Are you getting smashed at parties and taking selfies to post online?

  Someone landing on your social media will form an opinion of who you are just by looking at your first few social media posts. Are you condescending? Disrespectful? Have a harsh tone? Appear to lack good judgment in the company you keep?

  While you should always be authentic and true to yourself, there is always a way to voice your views with respect and kindness without isolating everyone in your space, and there are lots of ways to have fun without it getting out of control and becoming a permanent part of your online brand.

  THINK ABOUT IT: would a potential client or employer hire someone who is always ranting on their social media pages and seems to have a hard time controlling themselves in public? Hardly the type of person that looks or sounds attractive to hire or work with.

2. Personal Appearance

Do you show up for work or networking events neatly put together? You don’t need to wear the latest Prada fashion or look like a super model but being clean and tidy speaks volumes especially if you want to be paid what you are worth. When you value yourself, others will too. Do you follow and respect the dress code at work? Do you show up for meetings with clients on time, well rested and on your A-Game ready to contribute?

  THINK ABOUT IT: is an employer more likely to promote an employee and a client more likely to re-hire or refer someone who is well put together, takes pride in their appearance and meets expectations?

3. Personal Interactions

How you treat others online and in private conversations is a critical piece to your personal brand. Are you respectful and helpful? Are you argumentative and defensive? Are you commenting on social media posts trying to drive your point home?

  A simple screenshot of your comment or private message and it can be shared and posted thousands of times. Our words matter and they can leave a lasting online footprint and impression on people’s minds. They can strengthen our personal brands, or they can tear it down. When communicating online, through private message or text, it’s important to use discretion and discernment in how you react. The online world becomes a very small one very quickly.

  THINK ABOUT IT: While I don’t condone these types of actions, there are people who will put others on public blast. Once something is online its hard or nearly impossible to remove it. The next time you want to react defensively to another person, take a step back and ask yourself if you would be okay with what you have to say going public for all the world to see. You may think twice and spare your brand from any negative backlash.

    Guard the brand of you, for it’s the greatest asset you have. Your personal brand can work in your favor and bring incredible opportunities your way, or it can sabotage your dreams and hard work. Like so many young women who have been so close to fulfilling their dreams of becoming a Dallas Cowboy cheerleader, you could find yourself being turned down for a dream job or working with that dream client because a Google search led them to a moment of bad judgment.

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April Williams is a Creative Momista of 2 boys + freelance writer + creative expressive + Texas country girl who loves green mint tea + horses + fuzzy socks + peppermint anything + the color red + cozy coffee shops. She is a branding strategist and founder of Creative Brandista™

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question: What does the article say about online activities that aren't brand-friendly?

answer: The article states that some women would post ridiculously distasteful and crude things on the internet and say some distasteful and crude things, with some showing they are condoning violence and others being incredibly racist. The article states that those kinds of things would come back to haunt you if it went public, and it could be a huge deal breaker for people.

text: The response needs to be more specific about the consequences of dodgy online activities. For example, it could have said that posting distasteful things online could hurt your career and brand.

question: What does the article say about how to promote a brand online?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the article doesn't talk about personal branding online.

critique: The article does not answer the question.

critique: It is omitted that there is no answer. In the article, the author offers some tips to protect yourself from jeopardizing your personal brand.

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[Charlize Theron plays an overworked mom in “Tully.”]

Credit...Kimberly French/Focus Features

Tully
    Directed by Jason Reitman
    Comedy, Drama
    R
    1h 35m

-   May 3, 2018

“Tully,” a tragedy that thinks it’s a heartfelt comedy, stars Charlize Theron as a struggling mother. So let’s play along with this fantasy (for a bit). When you first meet her character, Marlo, she’s executing the familiar balancing act and juggling a pair of kids — with another one on the way — a husband and a two-story house that looks like it would take hours and hours to vacuum. The golden light that settles on her like a celestial mantle suggests that Marlo’s life is heavenly at least in moments, even if her clenched expression and haunted eyes read more like distress signals.

Marlo is doing the contemporary supermom thing and, refreshingly, she isn’t doing it with 1950s clichéd desperate smiles. Directed by Jason Reitman from a script by Diablo Cody (this is their third movie together), “Tully” admits that this figure is a noxious delusion, one that isn’t suitable for real women. Nevertheless they’re made to feel guilty for not doing it all or scolded for trying to live up to impossible standards. And soon enough the golden nimbus surrounding Marlo vanishes, swept away by the reality of hustling two children off to school while waiting for her water to break. (Lia Frankland plays the 8-year-old Sarah; Asher Miles Fallica plays the younger, ambiguously troubled Jonah.)

Mr. Reitman, as he does, goes for nice and easy, and everything in “Tully” flows when it doesn’t rush, picking up characters like Marlo’s husband, Drew (Ron Livingston), and her conspicuously wealthier brother, Craig (Mark Duplass). The casting of Mr. Livingston and Mr. Duplass — who look more like brothers than Mr. Duplass and his actual brother, Jay Duplass — plays like a joke without a punch line. All it really suggests is that Marlo, in marrying a less successful version of her brother, has some provocative psychosexual issues that the movie can’t be bothered with, mostly because it’s one of those character-driven stories that reduce personalities to a set of readily defined traits and quirks.

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To wit: Marlo is a quick draw when it comes to deadpan looks and sharp quips, but also, and of course, loving and exceptionally competent. Drew is a bland hard worker who plays video games in bed at night when Marlo crawls under the covers, a pattern that continues after she delivers their third child. Some might smack Drew’s joystick out of his hands and the rest of his sorry self out of bed — Ms. Theron is such a naturally strong presence that it’s hard to believe Marlo would put up with his nonsense. But that would get in the way of the story’s conceit and antediluvian take on gender roles.

And so it goes: Marlo cares for the kids while Drew works and plays, occasionally pausing to deliver one of those slightly surprised nice-guy looks that the likable Mr. Livingston has a near patent on: eyebrows gently perturbed, face drained of readable emotion, voice slightly rising as if in innocent protest. Drew and Marlo’s division of labor would be fine if it were equitable. But fairness wouldn’t jibe with the story’s plans for Marlo, much less enlightenment. Her burden is treated as grist for comedy, notably in the repeated images — fluttering like a flip book — of her enduring a lonely maternal crucible as she feeds and diapers the newborn again and again.

Marlo is rescued by Tully (Mackenzie Davis from the late, great AMC series “Halt and Catch Fire”), a night nurse whose job is to take over for exhausted mothers, allowing them much-needed sleep. Ms. Davis is a sparky, charismatic performer, and, much like her character, she whooshes into the story, infusing it with energy and scattering good vibes like a punk Tinker Bell. Under her caretaker’s attentive, adamant watch, Marlo again starts to smile, re-entering the world of the living. She brightens and so does “Tully,” which morphs into a female-friendship movie, complete with a nostalgic girls-wanna-have fun playlist calculated for maximum audience head-bobbing.

Ms. Theron and Ms. Davis make a pleasurable, watchable pair — Ms. Davis is obviously happy to be the moon to Ms. Theron’s sun — but “Tully” isn’t really interested in the sustaining joys of female bonding. It has a message to deliver, which is as sincere and decent as it is obvious: Mothers need help, sometimes serious help. Which is why it’s strange that as Marlo very visibly sinks into postpartum depression — you can see Ms. Theron pulling Marlo deeper and deeper inside — the movie pretends that her burden is somehow too hidden for anyone to notice. Much like her useless husband, it isolates Marlo, and once again it is a woman who’s the problem that needs solving.

question: What kind of an audience do you think the writers, producers, and director had in mind for "Tully"?

answer: It might be implied that the target audience for "Tully" could very well be moms.

critique: It's omitted that the wording makes it seem like it was made up that the target audience is moms.

critique: The article does not mention what kind of audience the writers, producers, and director had in mind for "Tully".

critique: "It might be implied that the target audience for "Tully" could very well be moms." - this is incorrect. The target audience for Tully is anyone who enjoys watching a movie about a struggling mom.


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ROY G. GERONEMUS (born March 5, 1953) is an American dermatologist in the field of laser treatment of skin disorders.

Career

Geronemus is the director of the Laser & Skin Surgery Center of New York.[1] He is also Clinical Professor of Dermatology at the New York University Medical Center.

Geronemus has contributed to the clinical development of laser and technology systems for devices for the treatment of skin problems including the pulsed dye laser[2] and the Picosecond laser.[3]

Geronemus' publications have covered treatments for port wine stains,[4][5][6] hemangiomas,[7][8][9] sun damaged skin, wrinkles, telangiectases, birthmarks,[10] skin laxity,[11][12] hair removal, tattoo removal[13] and Nevus of Ota removal.[14][15] Geronemus has advocated the early intervention of vascular birthmarks, encouraging treatment during early infancy.[16]

Awards and service

Geronemus is a past President of the American Society for Dermatologic Surgery and the American Society for Laser Medicine and Surgery.[17]

Geronemus received the 2001 Ellet Drake Memorial Award from the American Society for Laser Medicine and Surgery.[18]

He received the 2013 Samuel J. Stegman Award for Distinguished Service by the American Society for Dermatologic Surgery.[19]

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[4] Kauvar A, Geronemus R. “Pulsed dye laser therapy of resistant port-wine stains.” _Dermatol Surg._1995;21:515-21.

[5] Lou W, Geronemus R. “Treatment of port-wine stains by variable pulse width pulsed dye laser with cryogen spray: a preliminary study.” _Dermatol Surg._2001;27:963-5

[6] Geronemus R, Lou W, Quintana A, Kauvar A. “High fluence modified pulsed dye laser photocoagulation with dynamic cooling of port wine stains in infancy.” _Arch Dermatol._2000;136:942-3.

[7] Reddy KK, Blei F, Brauer JA, Waner M, Berstein L, Brightman LA, Hale EK, Karen JK, Weiss ET, Geronemus RG. “Infantile hemangiomas treated with a combination of propranolol and pulsed dye laser.” _Lasers Surg Med._2012;44(S24):3-4.

[8] Geronemus RG, Hunzeker CM. “Letter regarding early laser treatment of periorbital infantile hemangiomas may work, but is it really the best treatment option?” _Dermatol Surg._ 2010; 36(9):1495-97.

[9] Geronemus RG. “Pulsed dye laser treatment of vascular lesions in children.” _J Dermatol Surg Oncol._1993 Apr;19(4):303-10.

[10] Waldorf HA, Kauvar AN, Geronemus RG. “Treatment of small and medium congenital nevi with the Q-switched ruby laser.” _Arch Dermatol._1996 Mar;132(3):301-4.

[11] Brightman LA, Brauer J, Geronemus RG, Karen J, Hale E, Bernstein L, Weiss ET, Anolik R, Reddy K. Abstract of “3-dimensional evaluation of a minimally invasive fractional bipolar radiofrequency device for lifting and volumizing of the face.” _Lasers Surg Med._ 2012; 44(S24):12-3.

[12] Brightman L, Weiss E, Chapas A, Karen J, Hale E, Bernstein L, Geronemus RG. “Improvement in arm and post-partum abdominal and flank subcutaneous fat deposits and skin laxity using a bipolar radiofrequency, infrared, vacuum and mechanical massage device.” _Lasers Surg Med._2009;41:791-8.

[13] Brauer JA, Reddy KK, Anolik R, Weiss ET, Karen JK, Hale EK, Brightman LA, Bernstein L, Geronemus RG. “Successful and rapid treatment of blue and green tattoo pigment with a novel picosecond laser.” _Arch Dermatol._ 2012 Jul;148(7):820-3.

[14] Landau JM, Vergilis-Kalner I, Goldberg LH, Geronemus RG, Friedman PM. “Treatment of Nevus of Ota in Fitzpatrick skin type VI with the 1064-nm QS Nd:YAG laser.” _Lasers Surg Med._ 2011 Feb; 43(2):65-7.

[15] Geronemus RG. “Q-switched Ruby Laser Therapy of Nevus of Ota.” _Arch Dermatol._ 1992 Dec; 128(12):1618-22.

[16] Chapas AM, Eickhorst K, Geronemus RG. “Efficacy of early treatment of facial port-wine stains in newborns: A review of 49 Cases.” _Lasers Surg Med._ 2007 Aug;39(7):563-8

[17] Roy Geronemus, Chairman of the Board of NYSCF, profile at the New York Stem Cell Foundation. Accessed 2020-08-20.

[18] Ellet H. Drake Memorial Award, American Society for Laser Medicine and Surgery. Accessed 2020-08-18

[19] SAMUEL J. STEGMAN, MD, AWARD FOR DISTINGUISHED SERVICE, American Society for Dermatologic Surgery. Accessed 2020-08-18.

title: Roy Geronemus

question: Summarize Geronemus' awards.

answer: Geronemus was awarded the Distinguished Service by the American Society for Dermatologic Surgery in 2013. He received the 2001 Ellet Drake Memorial Award from the American Society for Laser Medicine and Surgery. He also received an award from the New York Stem Cell Foundation.

critique: "He also received an award from the New York Stem Cell Foundation." - is unattested.

critique: "He also received an award from the New York Stem Cell Foundation." - this is incorrect. The New York Stem Cell Foundation is not mentioned anywhere in the article.

critique: The last line is not relevant to the question.

critique: Doesn't mention the Samuel J. Stegman Award.

question: Summarize Geronemus' career.

answer: He has changed the way skin problems have been treated in the past 20-30 years. He is interested in laser and Pulse-Dye laser he has been involved in the development of both as Clinical Professor of Dermatology at New York University Medical Center. He has been involved in the treatment of multiple forms of birthmarks, the development of Laser & Skin Surgery Center of New York, and has been proactive in treament during infancy.

critique: The sentence "He is interested in laser and Pulse-Dye laser he has been involved in the development of both as Clinical Professor of Dermatology at New York University Medical Center." is confusing.

critique: The last two sentences are not necessarily related to his career.

critique: The article says he has been involved in the treatment of multiple forms of birthmarks, but it does not mention treatment during infancy.

text: The article doesn't mention that Geronemus "changed the way skin problems have been treated in the past 20-30 years."

category: accuracy

refinement: He has changed the way skin problems have been treated in the past 20-30 years. He is interested in laser and Pulse-Dye laser he has been involved in the development of both as Clinical Professor of Dermatology at New York University Medical Center. He has been involved in the treatment of multiple forms of birthmarks, the development of Laser & Skin Surgery Center of New York, and has been proactive in treament during infancy.


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ERODE VENKATTA NAICKER KRISHNASAMY SAMPATH( - 23 February 1977), usually referred to as _E. V. K. Sampath_ was a prominent politician from Tamil Nadu, India. He was an advocate of the Dravidian Movement of Periyar E. V. Ramasamy and was considered by some as his political heir.[1] He later split from Periyar's Dravidar Kazhagam to form Dravida Munnetra Kazhagam (DMK) along with C. N. Annadurai.[2] In spite of being one of the founders of DMK[3] he later left and formed his own party, by the name, Tamil National party. Nevertheless, he later merged his party with the Indian National Congress.[4] He is a former Member of Parliament from the constituency of Namakkal[5]

He belonged to a politically active family. He was nephew of Periyar and his father was an active politician himself. He is also the father of other prominent politicians of Tamil Nadu, namely, E. V. K. S. Elangovan and Iniyan Sampath and his wife Sulochana Sampath too was in active politics, holding high ranks within the Tamil Nadu government.[6]

Family

Sampath was born in the town of Erode, Madras Presidency as the son of E. V. Krishnasamy, the elder brother of Periyar E. V. Ramasamy in 1926. His family belongs to Balija naidu/naicker social group. Krishnasamy had extended extensive support to Periyar in his struggle for self-respect and social justice, and was one of the publishers of the journal Kudiarasu (Republic), the party organ for Justice party.[7]

In the year 1946 Sampath married Sulochana the daughter of Thirupathur G. Samy Naidu who was one of the pillars of the Justice party. Much later in life Sulochana Sampath held various high positions in the Tamil Nadu State Government including member of social welfare board, syndicate member of Annamalai University, Chairperson of Tamil Nadu Slum Clearance Board, Chairperson of Tamil Nadu Industrial Development Corporation, Chairperson of Tamil Nadu Text Book Society and Chairperson of Tamil Nadu Small Scale Industries Development Corporation. Sulochana was the organisation secretary of All India All India Anna Dravida Munnetra Kazhagam (AIADMK) and an AIADMK veteran for several years.[8] She died in June 2015, aged 86.[9][10]

Entry into politics

He was attracted to Periyar's self-respect movement since early days of his life.[11] The movement aimed at achieving a society where backward castes have equal human rights,[12] and encouraging backward castes to have self-respect in the context of a caste based society that considered them to be a lower end of the hierarchy.[13] As a student of the Intermediate Course in Pachaiyappa's College in Chennai, he participated in the programmes and agitations of DK. In the year 1944 he was declared as the Commander-in-chief of the _Black Shirt Brigade_ of Periyar's movement.[14]

In DMK

In 1949, he along with Annadurai split from the DK and formed their own party DMK.[15] The breakaway is attributed to the marriage of Periyar to a lady much younger.[16] The DMK picked up the Tamil Nationalistic ideologies from its parent organisation but upheld the principles of democratic party organisation.[17] In the inaugural function they had kept one empty chair on the head of the dais for Periyar, saying that he was their permanent leader.[18] However, faced with the reality of an independent India setting in motion the democratic process under a new Constitution, DMK preferred to keep the separatist issue on the backburner.[19]

Breakaway from DMK

In 1961 along with Tamil poet Kannadasan and Pazha Nedumaran he found a new party Tamil National Party.[20] The break away is variably attributed to be caused by personal difference that arose because of ascendency of M. Karunanidhi in the party [21] and also to the differences in DMK's call for independent nation of Dravida Nadu.[22] Sampath’s ideologies varied from those of Annadurai. The latter preferred constitutional means in pursuing a Tamil state and was keen on contesting in elections for the same. Sampath found Annadurai too moderate and pressed for more radical policies, direct actions and militant methods. Moreover, Annadurai was politically inclined towards Rajagopalachari’s Swatantra Party, whereas Sampath was keen to ally with the Communist Party of India. [23] Later one more founder members of DMK, actor Sivaji Ganesan[24] would move to Sampath's TNP,[25] after his feud with the DMK leadership and calling it a _glamour party_.[26]

Merger into Congress

In 1964 Sampath, with invitation from Kamaraj merged his party with the Congress. Sampath later started Congress journals namely _Tamil Cheithi, Jayaberigai (Dailies) and Alaigal_ (Weekly), but incurred heavy financial losses. To ensure the victory of the Congress Parliament candidates in Tamil Nadu, Indira Gandhi entrusted the entire election responsibility in the hands of Sampath in the year 1977. Sampath was made secretary of the Tamil Nadu Congress Committee and later appointed as the Vice-President of the TNCC. It was Sampath who translated the speeches made by Indira Gandhi into Tamil. Sampath donated his property, 'Jawahar Illam', at Erode, to be used as the Erode District Congress Committee headquarters. Till date the headquarters functions there. Sampath died on 23 February 1977.[27] A road in Vepery, Chennai and a government building complex in College Road, Chennai are named after him.[28][29]

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[2] The DMK and the Politics of Tamil Nationalism - Robert Hardgrave

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[4] Family background - Iniyan Sampath

[5] Members of second Lok Sabha.

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[8] http://www.eenaduindia.com/states/south/tamil-nadu/chennai-city/2016/12/25194122/EVKS-Elangovans-brother-floats-new-party-named-after.vpf

[9] http://www.thehindu.com/news/national/tamil-nadu/veteran-aiadmk-leader-sulochana-sampath-passes-away/article7289217.ece

[10] http://timesofindia.indiatimes.com/city/chennai/Veteran-AIADMK-leader-Sulochana-Sampath-dead/articleshow/47570798.cms

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[18] Selective atheism of Karunanidhi - Organiser

[19] A history of agitational politics - Frontline

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[25] Sivaji Ganesan - Memorable

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title: E. V. K. Sampath

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answer: He was an advocate of the Dravidian Movement of Periyar E.V. Ramasamy.

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Feeding the earth

The dull sky, in perfect agreement with the dead grass and muddy brown rocks on the mountain, hesitated between a morning drizzle and an afternoon light rain.  The narrow path to the mine was so heavily worn and slippery that it resembled one of those tracks of ice used by Europeans to race painted sleds in the winter.  El Inca couldn’t remember what it was called, but short scenes he had seen on his nephew’s TV played through his memory while he hauled his bent frame up the nearly impossible trail.  He knew men worked in teams pushing the sleds much like he and his fellow miners pushed their carts along the rails.

El Inca is not his given name.  His given name is something more forgettable, so common it has no meaning outside of normal, someone once asked him to write it on a document and he looked at them as if they had asked him to change the color of his eyes.  El Inca is his real name.  The young people in the village, even some of his own children, think it is a name of distinction because of his air of ancient wisdom and position in the community or at least a respectful reference to the profile of his eagle beak nose.  But, it has been his name since he was a child sitting and thinking in the corner of the house with his knees tucked under his chin and his skinny arms wrapped around his legs.  His father would laugh and say he looked like a mummy dried and weightless in a museum.  Soon everyone referred to him as The Inca whether he was thinking or not.  Not long after, he was working in the mines, had a home and a son of his own and he no longer had the luxury of sitting in the corner and thinking.  Now he does his thinking to the sound of creaking knees on the walk up and down the narrow slippery path.

Even more so than El Inca, the mine itself is nearly worn out.  The major vein of sliver was shipped to España in the sixteenth century to fight the Moors.  For the following four hundred years, the village men have kept their families just above absolute poverty by scratching for the leftovers.

At the top of the trail, El Inca no longer thought about the strange things he’d seen on TV.  He thought of entering the Mountain.  He thought of feeding the earth.  He looked at the heavy clouds and wished he could see the sun, hoped he would see the sun at least one more time.  Near the entrance he rummaged under his damp poncho and pulled a plump, round sweet bread from his pouch.  He stepped underground holding out his offering, his lips twitching in constant prayer while he made his way directly to El Diablo de la Montaña.

El Diablo is a carved effigy, half buried in cigarettes and cigars, its horned head dripping with wax and rum.  Tradition says the mountain takes a collection or it will take a life for every pound of silver it gives.  Most men give tobacco or pour out bottles of cheap rum or Coca-Cola.  Some miners keep candles burning constantly, but El Inca, he feeds the devil.  He believes that the mountain is hungry and the only way to keep it from eating you is to feed it something you cherish.  For this reason, every day he sacrifices the small round sweet cake his wife bakes for his lunch.

When he first started working in the mine he was only eleven and it was his mother who baked his sweet cakes but he did not give them up.  Like the others he lit a candle or left a cigar.  The sweet cake he ate himself, smiling, first thing in the morning before he climbed down into the mine with the thought of never coming out.  So good were the sweet cakes that even more unpleasant than the possibility of an early stone tomb was the thought of someone else eating his cake.

One day, the crumbs of his cake still riding on his tongue, he was caught in a cave in.  The exit shaft collapsed trapping him and three other men.  They spent three hungry days waiting while the way was cleared.  In the darkness he had promised the mountain that never again would a sweet cake touch his lips within the mine.  He promised that he would never tell his mother where her cakes went so he could be sure they were always made of the best ingredients.

Years later, El Inca knows it is the devils love of sweet breads that keep him safe.  The devil’s sweet tooth has made him the oldest miner in the mountain.  He has seen many a man give his last cigarette or bottle of soda to the statue and wondered why no one else knows what El Diablo truly desires.

After he set down the days offering he wondered how many more days he would climb the path, how many more days he would scratch at the rock in search of silver but most of all he wondered how many days until he could quit feeding the earth and eat his own sweet bread instead.

title: [RF] Feeding the Earth

question: What does the story say about the type of person El Inca is?

answer: El Inca is a hardworking man who has a wife and kids. He is known to be a thinker and a thinker of wisdom. The young people in the village think of El Inca as a person of distinction because of his air of ancient wisdom and position in the community. By no means does El Inca refuse to work but he thrives in offering his sweet bread to El Diablo.

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question: What does the story say about appeasing El Diablo?

answer: El Inca refers to El Diablo as "the hungry mountain", and he believes that the only way to keep it from eating you is to offer it something you cherish. After an accident in the mine, Inca started giving the statue of El Diablo his sweet bread everyday thinking that El Diablo likes sweet bread. However, El Inca is still alive today, the only person who is been able to keep his life for 400 years for appeasing El Diablo.

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1. El Inca believes El Diablo is hungry, not "the hungry mountain" as he calls it.
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question: What does the story say about why El Inca became a miner?

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[Top human rights award goes to education leader]

The former Secretary General of the Alliance of Concerned Teachers (ACT) in the Philippines has been named as recipient of a top international prize for trade union rights.

France Castro, a top trade union activist in the Philippines, has been named as the recipient of  the Arthur Svensson International Prize for Trade Union Rights 2019. Castro, who is the former Secretary General of the Alliance of Concerned Teachers (ACT), is renowned in the trade union world for her tireless defence of human rights in the Philippines. Indeed, her advocacy for human rights has also led to harassment of her as a consequence.

The prize was announced today by Sharan Burrow, General Secretary of the International Trade Union Confederation (ITUC).

CONTEXT

The Philippines is among the 10 worst countries in the world for workers and trade unionists, according to the ITUC. Basic workers’ rights are not respected, including the right to organise and collectively bargain and to be protected against child labour, discrimination and forced labour. Against a background of state violence and suppression of civil liberties, workers and trade unionists face threats and intimidation from the regime when defending their rights.

Castro and some of her colleagues at the ACT are among active trade unionists, in particular journalists and teachers, who have been targeted, harassed and prosecuted by the Duterte regime. Some activists have been killed or imprisoned and death threats are common. During a recent keynote speech at the Executive Board of Education International (EI), one of Castro’s colleagues highlighted recent illegal profiling and vilification of unionised teachers by the police. This has resulted in significant disruption of union activities and the invasion of teachers’ privacy.

CASTRO’S EXAMPLE

Castro has become a symbol for democracy and workers’ rights in her country. A qualified teacher, she established an education union in Quezon City, just north-east of the capital, Manila. Later, she was elected Secretary General of the ACT, which is a member of EI, and focused on uniting teachers within one trade union.

Under her leadership, the ACT has quickly grown to become one of the largest trade unions in the Philippines. In 2016, it negotiated the first collective agreement for public school teachers, which recognises the right to strike.

As an elected Member of the _Philippine_ House of Representatives, Castro has fought against neoliberal reforms in education and filed bills for the rights and welfare of education workers. She has also fought against lowering the minimum age of criminal responsibility, the mandatory Reserve Officer Training Corps in senior high school and targeting of minors in the regime’s anti-drug war.

She and her union have long been engaged in the defence of indigenous people’s right to education, activism that led to her being attacked by paramilitary forces and detained during a solidarity mission in Lumad schools in Talaingod last November.

_The Arthur Svensson prize is granted to a person or an organisation that has worked predominantly to promote trade union rights and/or to strengthen trade union organising around the world. The prize is an international award established by the Norwegian trade union, Industri Energi. It is awarded annually by the Committee for the Arthur Svensson International Prize for Trade Union Rights._

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answer: The Alliance of Concerned Teachers (ACT) is a trade union in the Philippines. It is a member of the Education International. Castro, the former Secretary General of ACT, is a top trade union activist in the Philippines. She has been named as the recipient of the Arthur Svensson International Prize for Trade Union Rights 2019. ACT has quickly grown to become one of the largest trade unions in the Philippines.

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THOMAS ALLSTON BROWN (January 16, 1836 – April 2, 1918) was an American theater critic, newspaper editor, talent agent and manager, and theater historian, best known for his books, _History of the American Stage_ (Dick & Fitzgerald: New York, 1870) and _A History of the New York Stage from the First Performance in 1732 to 1901_ (Dodd Mead: New York, 1902).

Life and career

Brown was born in Newburyport, Massachusetts, to Thomas James Brown (1800–1867) and Lucretia Hamsly Brown _(née_ Lucretia Hamsly Milton; 1810–1872).[1] He began his career as the Philadelphia correspondent and theater critic for the top entertainment journal of the time, the _New York Clipper_. He freelanced for other show-business publications and published his own paper, called _The Tattler_.[2][3]

In 1860, Brown entered show business as the advance man for the Cooper English Opera Company, managed by virtuoso violinist Henry Charles Cooper (1819–1881). He later worked for Gardner & Madigan's Circus (re: the Gardner and Madigan families, including Dan Gardner and John Madigan) as treasurer and manager of the box office.[4] During one circus performance, the assistant to the ropewalker Blondine went missing. Blondine's opening stunt was to walk a tightrope from the stage to the balcony with a person on his back. T. Allston Brown filled in for the missing helper, and the _Baltimore Press_ dubbed him “Colonel” for the deed. Brown adopted the honorary title and used it for the remainder of his career.[5]

In 1863, Brown was named editor of the _New York Clipper_. He kept the post until 1872, when he retired from journalism. He next pursued a career as an agent and manager for entertainers. His clients included the famous female impersonator Ernest Byne (1848–1904), the Hanlon Brothers, and Mlle. Marie Aimée (sv) (1852–1857). On May 7, 1879, Brown became partner with Morris Simmonds (1839–1896) in Simmonds & Brown, Dramatic Agents, and continued to run the company after Simmonds died.[6]

As early as 1858, Brown had begun compiling stories and biographies of theatrical performers in the United States.[7] Much of his material came from players in the field, who supplied biographical sketches.[8] He began to write a book on the subject, and in 1870 he published the exhaustive _History of the American Stage_.[9][10] In 1906, he retired from show business to devote more time to history and writing.[11] Brown died in Philadelphia in 1918. _The New York Times_ wrote in Brown's obituary that _A History of the New York Stage_, published in 1903, “was said to be one of the most complete accounts of the development of the stage in America that has been written”.[12][13]

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[1] Thomas Allston Brown, Massachusetts, Town Records, 1620-1988, Ancestry.com

[2] Cullen 147.

[3] Sentilles 122.

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title: T. Allston Brown

question: Describe Hamsley Brown's career trajectory from critic to historian and author.

answer: Brown began his career as a Philadelphia correspondent and theater critic for the New York Clipper. He later freelanced for other show-business publications. He published his own paper, called The Tattler. In 1860, Brown entered show business as the advance man for the Cooper English Opera Company. He then worked for Gardner & Madigan's Circus as treasurer and manager of the box office. In 1863, Brown was named editor of the New York Clipper. He kept the post until 1872, when he retired from journalism. He then pursued a career as an agent and manager for entertainers. In 1906, he retired from show business to devote more time to history and writing.

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A broad range of metabolic and inflammatory diseases is associated with alterations in gut microbiota composition and metabolic potential. Until now, sequencing-based gut microbiota research has described such dysbiotic states in terms of proportional shifts in microbiome composition. However, when it comes to the gut bacterial content and how it relates to health, it's not only percentages that matter, but also numbers. That is according to the latest research by Jeroen Raes (VIB-KU Leuven) and his team, published today in _Nature_.

In their manuscript titled "Quantitative microbiome profiling links gut community variation to microbial load," the VIB-KU Leuven scientists demonstrate a novel methodology that allows both fast and accurate determination of the bacterial load in a fecal sample.

Prof. Jeroen Raes (VIB-KU Leuven): "The method we developed is based on parallelization of microbiome sequencing and flow cytometry enumeration of microbial cells in fecal material. The combination of these two workflows enables us to generate true quantitative microbiome profiles expressed as numbers of cells per gram, rather than percentages."

According to the VIB-KU Leuven researchers, Quantitative Microbiome Profiling can really make a difference.

Prof. Jeroen Raes (VIB-KU Leuven): "Until now, proportional approaches have been the standard in microbiome research. However, without quantitative data, percentages cannot tell you whether a particular bacterium is actually becoming more abundant under specific conditions. A proportional increase could just as well imply that this species of interest is just maintaining is initial levels, while all other taxa are declining. This makes it very difficult to link microbiome data to quantitative health parameters and infer disease mechanisms. With Quantitative Microbiome Profiling, we are one step closer to solving this issue."

In 2012, Jeroen Raes and his team launched the Flemish Gut Flora Project, one of the first population-level microbiome monitoring efforts worldwide. VIB-VUB-KU Leuven scientists collected over 3000 fecal samples from healthy volunteers. This collection allowed them to assess microbiome variation in a non-diseased population. The results of the Flemish Gut Flora Project proved to be essential for the interpretation of the lab's quantitative microbiome findings.

Prof. Jeroen Raes (VIB-KU Leuven): "Using the Flemish Gut Flora Project database, we were able to identify a new microbiota community type based on quantitative findings. This enterotype is characterized by a low microbial load. It harbors lower abundances of taxa that might play a role in maintaining a healthy gut ecosystem. While we do observe this enterotype to be present in a minority of healthy volunteers, it is by far the most prevalent microbiota configuration among Crohn's Disease patients."

Prof. Séverine Vermeire, gastroenterologist at UZ Leuven/KU Leuven: "Using Quantitative Microbiome Profiling, we observed that feces from Crohn's Disease patients harbor up to 50 times less bacteria than those of healthy volunteers. This striking decrease in bacterial abundance appears to be a key element of dysbiosis in Crohn's Disease. Next steps will be to find out whether having a low cell count enterotype increases your risk of developing Crohn's Disease—and if so, what can be done to prevent it."

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critique: The passage is talking about dog training in general.

question: What does the text say about the definition of an E-Collar?

answer: E-Collars are a remote dog training system that consists of a wireless remote and a wireless receiver. E-Collars allow the owner to remotely send signals to the dog to help them understand good behavior and bad behavior. With stimulation levels ranging from 1 to 100, the E-Collars allow the owner to adjust the stimulation to a level that is best suited to gently communicate with the dog. The dog collar range is a hunting dog collar or working dog collar for a longer range than a pet training collar.

critique: The range of frequencies is irrelevant since the question isn't seeking a definition.

critique: This is not a definition of the E-Collar. It is a description of the E-Collar.

critique: The answer is a copy-and-paste of the text.

critique: The answer is a copy-and-paste of the article.

critique: The answer is a lot of information that is not useful.

question: Why should dog owners get an E-Collar instead of a traditional shock collar?

answer: E-Collars use a form of stimulus that targets the neck muscles of the dog; mimicking the loving touch of their mother. E-Collars use stimulation levels from 1 to 100, allowing the owner to adjust the stimulation to a level that is best suited to gently communicate with the dog. The electronic dog collars have the advantage of being able to adjust stimulation to a higher level when necessary.

critique: Grammatical error - "Electronic dog collars" should be "electronic dog collars"

critique: The answer should mention that the stimulation is not harmful.

critique: The answer does not mention that the dog training collar range is different for hunting dog collars and working dog collars.

critique: The answer should mention that the stimulation does not cause lasting damage.

critique: The model's answer goes over the same information as the article.

question: What is the general misconception about electronic dog collars?

answer: The misconception is that electronic dog collars cause physical harm or lasting damage to a dog.

critique: The answer should mention that the misconception is about shock collars.

critique: The answer should mention that the collars are used to get a dog's attention, not as a form of punishment.

critique: "The misconception is that electronic dog collars cause physical harm or lasting damage to a dog." - This part is too general and contains a potential verbosity error.

critique: The answer could be more specific about what the misconception is.

critique: The answer could be phrased as a complete sentence.


text:
LESTER B. PEARSON SCHOOL FOR THE ARTS is a public, elementary - Grades 4 to 8, school in London, Ontario, Canada, part of the Thames Valley District School Board. Most students begin in the Grade 4 year, though there are occasional openings in other grades.

Academics

The academic program is rigorous and based on the Ministry of Education (Ontario) curriculum. Teachers are fully qualified members of the Ontario College of Teachers and are specialists in their particular arts area. The school day is about an hour longer than other public schools, to allow for the arts enriched curriculum. Students at Pearson carry a heavy homework load. EQAO results reflect the value of an arts education for all students. Identified gifted students participate in the TVDSB Itinerant Gifted Program. Extracurricular sports include Volleyball, Basketball, Cross Country, and Track & Field. Pearson teams and individual athletes do very well in inter-school and regional competitions.

Arts curriculum

Dance

Students have dance class several times a week in studios with sprung wood floors. Dances go from ballet to hip-hop to swing, with emphasis on collaboration, expression and technique.

Drama

At Pearson, there are different shows going on throughout the year. The Grade 4 students do a small performance that is usually composed of a number of skits. The Grade 5 students do a play that is based on the historical curriculum on First Nations. In the past years the Grade 6s have done many performances including: “Number the Stars”, “A Midsummer Night's Dream”, “Ready Steady Go”, “Clowns”, and “How to Eat like a Child”, and the beloved “A Christmas Carol”. The Grade 7s spend most of the year doing drama units including Voice Unit, Improvisation, Character Unit, Stage Combat, Design Unit, and sometimes a staged weapons unit, but the Grade 7s do not actually produce a show. The Grade 8s do two shows. They always produce a Shakespearean Play, and an original play that they write, design, and perform themselves.

Music

Three components: Vocal, Keyboard, and an Instrument.

Each grade has Single Vocal where you learn theory and music history, and Double Vocal where both the classes in a grade learn to sing together as a choir and develop individual choral technique. The Pearson Singers, an auditioned SAT choir of approximately 70 in Grades 5–8, rehearses twice a week in the early morning. The Singers have toured Carnegie Hall, Canterbury Cathedral, Chicago, and New Brunswick. The “Twelve” is an SATB group of approximately 12–18 Grade 8 students who perform more complex pieces with more solo work. At the end of the year the whole school does a massive Choral Celebration at H.B. Beal Secondary School.

Every student receives instruction on the keyboard. Grade 4s are introduced to recorder and piano. Beginning in Grade 5, each student trains on either a string or wind instrument and performs numerous concerts with that instrument all the way through Grade 8.

The Stage Band is a special winds group consisting of only saxophones, trombones and trumpets that play jazz music and tour around the city.

Visual Art

Subjects are covered from Picasso to Two Point Perspective: Art History, Drawing, Painting, Stained Glass(Grade 8), Ceramics, Design & Colour Theory. Students are educated in Canadian visual artists as well, such as Emily Carr, Pitseolak Ashoona, and the Group of Seven.

Other

The school has a workshop, used to build and store props and sets for plays. In the winter after New Year's Day the whole school goes on a ski trip at Boler Mountain. At year end, Grades 4, 5 and 7 go to East Park for a day. Grade 6 goes to Camp Kawartha, Grade 7 to Canada's Wonderland and Grade 8 to Quebec City.

Summer Arts Camp

Each year a series of two-week summer arts camps are offered at the school, with Pearson teachers or other TVDSB art specialist teachers. Some kids return every year.

Notable alumni

Though Pearson is not a performing arts school, some graduates have gone on to performing or arts-related careers.

-   Trevor Blumas, Actor
-   Rebecca Liddiard, Actress
-   Luke Macfarlane, Actor
-   Sam Maggs, Author
-   Amber Marshall, Actor
-   Meaghan Smith, Singer
-   Kyle Blair, Actor
-   Mark Uhre, Actor

title: Lester B. Pearson School for the Arts

question: Summarize the school's history.

answer: No answer

critique: The article has a section on the school's history.

critique: The input does not provide any information about the school's history.

critique: The answer should mention the school's location.

question: Summarizer everything related to the faculty.

answer: The teachers are fully qualified members of the Ontario College of Teachers and are specialists in their particular arts area. The school day is about an hour longer than other public schools, to allow for the arts enriched curriculum.

critique: The school day is not relevant to the faculty.

critique: The last sentence is redundnat-the answer speaks about time in the context of the teachers' hours of work.

critique: The response misses to mention that the teachers specialize in the arts areas.

critique: The response misses to mention that the teachers are specialists in their particular arts area.

critique: The response is missing the EQAO results.

question: Summarize everything relating to performances.

answer: Students at Pearson carry a heavy homework load. The Grade 4 students do a small performance that is usually composed of a number of skits. The Grade 5 students do a play that is based on the historical curriculum on First Nations. The Grade 6s have done many performances including: “Number the Stars”, “A Midsummer Night's Dream”, “Ready Steady Go”, “Clowns”, and “How to Eat like a Child”, and the beloved “A Christmas Carol”. The Grade 7s spend most of the year doing drama units including Voice Unit, Improvisation, Character Unit, Stage Combat, Design Unit, and sometimes a staged weapons unit, but the Grade 7s do not actually produce a show. The Grade 8s do two shows. They always produce a Shakespearean Play, and an original play that they write, design, and perform themselves.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The answer says that no performing arts are done at the school, while they do have a performance curriculum. This is inaccurate and cannot be present in the summary.

critique: This is irrelevant and should be omitted.

text: Add the musical performances: "The Pearson Singers have toured Carnegie Hall, Canterbury Cathedral, Chicago, and New Brunswick. The “Twelve” is an SATB group of approximately 12–18 Grade 8 students who perform more complex pieces with more solo work. At the end of the year the whole school does a massive Choral Celebration at H.B. Beal Secondary School."


text:
Sorry in advance, my new year's resolution was to try my hand at writing at least once a week, so this is my sloppy first attempt at a pointless short story. Bear with me, it really is pretty short.

	I looked down and saw the little pock marks on the long bruises I called arms, and rolled down my sleeves. There was a whistling sound in my head driving me bad shit mad.

...

	So he looked at me with his sad face, with his petty remorse and his puppy dog eyes. “I have to do this, and I’m offering you a place in my committee because I want you to be here with me, making more money than you already do and hopefully living a better life.”

	I was fuming but something was gnawing at me in the back of my head. What if he was saying this kindly, not sarcastically? It took me a second to register that he wasn’t faking any emotions.

	I realized that the entire life I had known him he was a real, authentic individual. I guess the past several years had taken its toll on me, and I may have become slightly cynical. I looked up and into his eyes and saw no dark spots of mal-intent. He was a businessman, yes, and a wealthy and calculated one at that. But he had a core, sensible and clean, that he had always held within him since before he was picking my sorry ass off the floor after fights in junior high. He legitimately cared for me, but as I usually did, I dug deeper. I thought about his goals. He had a family, and however poorly he treated his kids, the real kindness you can find in a man isn’t reflected by how often he treats his children, but simply how he treats them. Molding them to have traits for success isn’t a poor thing of him to do at all, and when he was kind and loving to them it was golden with no itemistic parts. He never treated them to ice cream or toys as rewards, they had birthdays and christmas, but even then maybe a surprise toy wasn’t the worst thing in the world for them. It was more the principle that a reward system was right for his kids, he would rather them be content with what they had. It was important to him, contentedness, the rich, bussiness-expanding, effluent douchebag.

	He just gave them his holy words and that was more than enough to have them happy for that day and give them a lingering dad-high for the rest of the week.

But in the end, he valued his family over me. He knew that in the end, he would have to do something about me, and bringing me in was the best he could do. No, he just wanted to do it, the difference being that I could tell he wanted this all along, for me to with him.

I selfishly said no.

I told him I had more important things to do than to be in his heartless rich-boy 401k club and told him my family relied on me and it was all lies, every word. I wanted to tear up and give him the hug I had held in since junior high, but my head was somewhere else. It was as if somebody else had taken over my body and was headstrong, pessimistic, and a complete and utter liar. I told him to fuck off, and I told him to kill himself. I wanted to be dead. My family hated me and I was going down the rabbit hole. I was going to be homeless in a week and a day if by tomorrow he decided to go through with his plan.

	I walked up, sarcastically thanked him, feinted him a handshake and then punched him in his jaw. As hard as I possibly could. Who did he think he was? Toying with my emotions as he did.
	 He took another blow to the face. Somebody other than me was doing it, I swear. I was next to the man doing it, looking at HIM over his shoulder, but he was getting bloodier and bloodier. I got up and saw blood on my knuckles. That’s weird, I thought. There was no blood from my first hit on him. His lip split on the third blow. I shrugged, confused, and left the room. I could hear him crying. Maybe it was me. My world was bending, swirling into a hole, and I wasn’t even fighting the current dragging me into it. I laughed and fell into the rabbit hole, cursing love and intentions, where they could never hurt me again. I looked up, saw the sky and broken glass, which was falling, increasing in velocity, but never passing me. It was a curious sight, I wonder why it wa-

title: Out of place and into the dark (Cheesy as fuck title)

question: Summarize the man's views on parenthood.

answer: He believes that molding his children to have traits for success isn't a poor thing to do. He would rather them be content with what they have. He doesn't treat them to ice cream or toys as rewards. He believes that a reward system is right for his kids.

critique: His children deserve the best he can give them, not just the bare necessities

critique: The answer should mention that he is a good father.

critique: The answer should mention that the man is a father.

critique: The answer should mention that the man treats his children kindly and lovingly.

question: What are the misfortunes the protagonist is suffering?

answer: He worries what if the other guy isn't being sincere, as he has a feeling as though something isn't right. He fears that if he takes up the offer, he will be subject to the other guy's whims and wishes. The other guy is also a rich guy and will probably be working for the betterment of himself and his own family. The protagonist is a bum and has a family that doesn't need him. His acceptance of the offer, will deprive his family of his meager income and he is being selfish.

critique: The narrator's family doesn't need him. He's worried about his family's reaction to his homelessness.

critique: The answer is a summary of the story, not a list of the protagonist's misfortunes.

critique: He didn't really have reason for believing something was wrong (the other person being kind to him). It isn't mentioned that he wandered off and got lost.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The answer is a summary of the story, not a description of the protagonist's misfortunes.

question: Summarize the narrator's fate at the end of the story.

answer: The narrator is in a state of confusion and disbelief at the end of the story. He is in a state of mind where he is not sure if he is the one who is hitting the man or not. He is also in a state of mind where he is not sure if he is the one who is crying or not. He is also in a state of mind where he is not sure if he is the one who is falling into a rabbit hole or not.

critique: The narrator is not in a state of confusion about hitting the man or crying. He is confused about his emotions and the state of his mind.

critique: Some accuracy issues with the phrasing but the endpoint seems accurate

critique: The narrator is not in a state of confusion and disbelief at the end of the story.

critique: It is not stated that the narrator is in a state of confusion and disbelief at the end of the story. He is in a state of mind where he is not sure if he is the one who is hitting the man or not. He is also in a state of mind where he is not sure if he is the one who is crying or not. He is also in a state of mind where he is not sure if he is the one who is falling into a rabbit hole or not.

text: It is incorrect that the narrator was not sure if he was the one falling into a rabbit hole or not.

question: What does the story say about work ethic?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention the narrator's work ethic.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The story does talk about work ethic.

critique: Work ethic is briefly addressed by the author.

critique: The narrator's work ethic is discussed in the story.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator is offered a job by a friend.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator is offered a place in a rich man's committee.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The story does mention work ethic.

critique: The answer should mention the protagonist's reflections on his friend's work ethic.


text:
 The sun was shining brightly through the thinly veiled curtains.  It warmed the room quickly.  I could feel small beads of sweat bubble up under the sheet we were wrapped in.  Your naked body still pressed firmly into mine.  The wind blew through one slightly opened window.  The cool air crept under the sheet, rushed over my body, evaporated the small beads of sweat, and gave me an instant chill.  I pulled your warm body even tighter into mine and kissed your neck.  You gave a little moan and a stretch.  I whispered, "Good morning."  On this day, you were brand new to me again.  Had you been there all along?  Or was this really new?  I couldn't remember.  I felt like I had known you forever and yet still needed to tell you everything.  I gave your back a kiss and said, "Let's go make some coffee."  You nodded as you arched your beautiful body and stretched the "sleepy" out of your fingers and toes.  I had to watch.

   I made the coffee and you poured the cereal.  We sat staring, sipping and eating.  I smiled at you like a fool.  You blushed and smiled back.  Why did this feel so familiar and new at the same time?  I grabbed the paper and we worked the crossword.  It was a perfect tandem.  You got all the clues for words I hadn't heard prior.  I got the more obvious pop culture ones.  We finished it quickly and had more coffee on the porch.  We watched some birds flitting around in the large oak off the corner of the porch.  I liked how watching made you smile.  So I smiled.  I suggested we go for a walk around the woods.  You nodded.

   We walked and talked for hours.  We talked about our favorite music and movies.  Had we always liked the same things?  Or was this the first time we had talked about it?  Maybe I was just now listening.  Maybe I knew long ago and had forgotten.  We talked about the future and how we saw ourselves and how we felt others perceived us.  We really were the same.  How wonderful it felt.  Why hadn't we talked like this before?  Or was this our first chance?  The whole journey was clouded by muddy memories.  However, the destination was crystal clear.  Would you hold my hand while we ventured toward it?  We stopped to rest under a huge elm.  Its branches reached over top of us and bent slightly toward the Earth as if it were hugging our presence.

   I looked into your eyes and touched your face.  Had you always been this beautiful?  Had you changed something recently?  Or was this really the first time I had a chance to look?  No matter.  I leaned in and kissed your lips.  You were warm, soft, and tasted sweet.  I could have kissed you for hours.  Maybe I did.  It seemed like forever in a second.  I pulled you down and we lay under the elm.  We stared for moments on end.  Then broke into conversation about something so asinine, we would fall into each other laughing.    The sun began its decent into the western side of the stage.  The curtain was calling on our day.

   We walked hand in hand back to the house swinging our arms like two young kids.  It seemed like this had all happened before.  Had we been lovers when we were younger?  Did it just seem that way because of the level of comfort we had?  Or was this really the dopamine receptors kicking in for new love?  It didn't matter it was amazing.  The porch light shined like a welcoming beacon.  The bugs danced around it, hitting the globe, bouncing off it, and coming back for more.  I felt like those bugs sometimes in life trying to get at the white hot center of it all; only to bounce off life's invisible force field of reality and return from a new direction.  We walked into the house and your bags sat at the stairs.  I was surprised and shocked by their sight.  However, I knew in an instant it was how it had to be.  I pulled you close and we embraced very tightly.  I gave you one last kiss.  Your eyes filled with tears, as did mine.  Your sadness reflected mine.   In your eyes, I relived all the memories of that day and smiled.  You smiled back.  I whispered, "You're coming back aren't you?"  You shook your head "no" but said, "Of course I will my sweet."  At that moment, I knew exactly what you meant, but would later forget.

title: [RO] Forgotten Under the Elm

question: What does the text say about what the narrator does after getting out of bed?

answer: After getting out of bed, the narrator makes coffee and the woman pours cereal. Then the narrator reads the newspaper while the woman does the crossword.

critique: The crossword is a way to segment the actions, as is the walk. The walk was not just a wander in the woods. Include the walk in the answer to make the structure make more sense. Include that they walk hand-in-hand.

critique: The answer omits that the narrator and woman go for a walk in the woods.

question: What does the text say about what the narrator's partner means at the end of the story?

answer: The narrator's partner means that she will come back to the narrator, but she will not. The narrator knows this, but will forget.

critique: The narrator doesn't know that she won't come back.

critique: The narrator doesn't know this. He forgets.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The narrator asks the partner if she will be returning, to which she replies no. This means she will not be returning.


text:
I remember once I found out I had a mouse. Not like I owned it or anything. I just had one that came into my house at least once because I saw it.

It was in the middle of the night, and I guess I should admit that it wasn't a house at all, it was an apartment. I want to be honest with you all about the whole situation.

Anyway, so I woke up to this noise and looked over into my kitchen, that's how much of not a house this apartment was - I could look into my kitchen from my bedroom. Maybe this story is really more about how I didn't have a house. But really, I think it's about the mouse. And that wasn't in anyway intentional rhyming.

Moving on, I looked over and I heard bags moving around. I keep all the bags from the grocery store to use as garbage bags. I'm frugal in that way. That and the part where I bought an apartment where you can see the kitchen from the bedroom.

Once again, I lied, I did not buy the apartment, I rented it. Anyway, back to the mouse.

So, I look over and see nothing, because the bags were in the cabinet under the sink, but I could hear the mouse. I got up and grabbed my clock radio as that was the nearest weapon. Then I started thinking about how I'd have to throw the clock radio out if I got mouse all over it and decided against that move. So, it was decided that I should use hairspray against the mouse. These decisions were made in the dead of night when a man has no time to think about weaponry or physics or common sense.

I approached the cabinet. At this point your biggest worry is that it's not a mouse but a rat. Or not a rat but a cat. Because that would be really bad if you totally forgot you had a cat and then maced it with hairspray because you thought it was a mouse. I'm thinking that and nuclear war are up there on my list of fears.

I opened the cabinet and it was just a little guy. He looked at me and then I looked at him and then I sprayed him with hair spray. The mouse paused and kindov gave me a look like "really? hairspray?" and then darted off.

It's amazing how fast a mouse can run. I mean, it's like fast. Like if you saw a guy running down the street and then a guy running passed him, it would be like that fast.

The next day I went out and bought some poison. I didn't want to kill the mouse, but I wanted him to think that I served bad food. That way, he wouldn't come back. So, I just kinda put out only a little poison. The mouse ate all of it. This went on for three days. Finally, I told the apartment manager and they got a guy to come in and put out poison for me. This was good because I didn't want to be the guy that killed the mouse. I'm a coward in that sense. Also, I'm frugal. You'd be surprised how many cowards are frugal. There's like three of us. Not many. I know when you say "You'd be surprised how many..." you think it's going to be a butt ton of things, but no, in this instance it's three guys.

So, the guy came and I came home from work and called him.

"Did you see it?"

"Yes. We put down glue traps and we caught it."

"Glue traps? You didn't poison it?"

"No, we use glue traps."

"Did you catch any glue?" At this point I was being funny. I thought he would find it funny that I didn't understand glue traps. But I did. I was just being funny.

"I don't understand." He didn't understand.

"So, it's dead?"

"Yes."

"God." I put the phone against my chest and kinda got weepy. I then picked up the phone and "How was its hair?"

"I don't understand?"

I ignored him. "So, are the mice gone?"

"I don't know, sir. There are more traps left. Please check them daily. Also, it would be wise to clean your apartment a bit."

The two ideas hit me like a frugal coward: I had to look for dead mouse bodies every morning and I was a filthy animal. Oh, plus I was condoning the torture of mice.

"Can't you do that?"

"We will be back in a week. You have crumbs in your kitchen. You need to sweep your kitchen. If there's no food for the mice they will not come into your home."

"It's an apartment."

"Bye now."

He hung up and I realized I had to become a man.

The next morning there were mouse bodies. But they weren't dead. They were running from me as I brandished a bottle of Pam at them. I saw two.

I then checked the traps and found no dead bodies. I was relieved and disappointed at the same time. I decided to leave the apartment. I made plans to go skiing and leave the mice to their own demise.

While on the ski trip I began wondering what the mice were doing? What were they thinking? Were they dead? Were they wondering where I was? Did they have a name for me? Slowly, I began to love the mice and when this dawned on me I fled home to find them.

But on returning they were all gone. Not dead. No, they had left. With no food and torture devices laying around the house...apartment, they had quickly surmised that I was not their friend. Sure, there was that night with the hairspray and the running after them with cooking spray - those were some good times, but in the end I had ruined it with my selfishness.

I simply could not learn to share with the mice and so they left.

I wasn't the same after that. I was still a frugal coward living in an apartment, but something inside me was broken. Something vital.

It was my arm. I had broken it skiing and forgot to mention it in that part in the story when I was on the skiing vacation and all of a sudden left.

Later, I would buy a dog and dress it up like a mouse and really wreck the dog's self esteem and the dog would become a dog serial killer, but that is another story. A story where a dog dresses up as a mouse and kills other dogs for sport. I call it Benji.

But that story is for another time.

title: [hm] Mouse

question: How do the narrator's thoughts about the mice change through the story?

answer: The narrator thinks the mice are pests, and he wants to get rid of them. He tries to poison them, but they eat all the poison. He then tries to trap them with glue, but they escape. He finally realizes that he has to share his home with the mice and they leave.

critique: The narrator doesn't think the mice are pests.

critique: The narrator doesn't want to share his home with the mice.

critique: The narrator doesn't want to share his home with the mice. He wants to get rid of them.

critique: The narrator doesn't realize he has to share his home with the mice. He realizes he has to become a man.

critique: The narrator doesn't realize he has to share his home with the mice. He just wants to get rid of them.

critique: "He then tries to trap them with glue, but they escape." - the narrator never tried to trap the mice with glue. It was the apartment manager's idea.

text: The narrator does not want to share his home with the mice. Also, the narrator did not leave because of that reason. The use o. "they" in the last sentence is wrong,

question: What does the story say about the narrator's neighbors?

answer: No answer

critique: The narrator's neighbors are not mentioned.

critique: The narrator doesn't have any neighbors.

critique: The text doesn't say anything about the narrator's neighbors.

critique: The narrator lives in an apartment, so it's possible that he has neighbors.

critique: The narrator mentions his neighbors when he talks about the apartment manager.