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By Colleen Coble

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Hello, my name is Colleen Coble, and I’m a major extrovert. I know you’ve all heard all authors are introverts and huddle in their closets with a laptop while they write, but it’s not true. There are some of us strange creatures around who prefer parties to privacy.

People sometimes ask what is the most challenging part of writing, and for those of us who are extroverts, it’s the solitude. There are weeks when I’m on a tight deadline and don’t leave the house except for church on Sunday. That can take its toll on my mental energy. What’s a girl to do?

Answer: social media! I know, I know, that’s another thing you’ve heard. Social media is the bane of our existence, and it’s something we have to do because our publishers and readers expect it. But I want to challenge you to turn it around and think of it as something beneficial for you as well. You will make great friends and find awesome support online if you change your attitude.

First off, figure out which social media speaks to you the most. Blogging, Facebook, Twitter, Instagram, Pinterest, or Periscope are all valuable to you if you enjoy them. I’ve tried them all, but Facebook is my favorite. I have instant interaction with readers the moment I hop over there.

Second, be yourself. Don’t talk about your books all the time. Reveal who you really are. Put down your mask. What are your interests outside of your books? Mine is health, and I’m always posting articles about how we can use food to make use healthier. My readers all know I’m a health nut, and they often share things of interest with me as well. My characters are likely to eat a gluten-free, sugar-free diet and using essential oils so my books follow my interests as well. And I love coffee and The Walking Dead.

Third, treat your readers as friends. Answer their questions, respond to their comments, and share their posts as well. It’s all about interaction. Encourage them to share their lives with you as well as sharing yours with them.

My readers have given me so much: encouragement on the dark days, laughter, prayers, companionship, and so much more. When those days of tight deadlines fall on my head, I have a host of friends available at my keyboard to keep me company. It’s made solitude much more bearable for this mega-extrovert, but these tips will help you reach your readers as well even if you crave solitude. You can always shut your computer!

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I know you’re thinking this takes too much time, but it really doesn’t. That’s an excuse writers use to avoid doing anything on social media because they dread it. If you change your attitude about it and see it as talking with friends, it will seem much less onerous, and I think you’ll find yourself with more friends than you ever thought was possible. I sure have!

So how about you? If you’re an extrovert like me, how do you handle the isolation?
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Best-selling autor Colleen Coble’s novels have won or finaled in awards ranging from the Best Books of Indiana, the ACFW Carol Award, the Romance Writers of America RITA, the Holt Medallion, the Daphne du Maurier, National Readers’ Choice and the Booksellers Best. She has more than three million books in print and writes romantic mysteries because she loves to see justice prevail. Coble is CEO of American Christian Fiction Writers. She lives with her husband, Dave, in Indiana. To keep up with Colleen Coble, visitwww.colleencoble.com, become a fan onFacebook (colleencoblebooks) or follow her onTwitter (@colleencoble).

question: What does the text say about writing?

answer: According to Colleen Coble, the most challenging part of writing is the solitude. This is because there are times when she's on a tight deadline and doesn't leave the house, which negatively affects her mental energy. She also says that some authors are introverts who prefer privacy over parties.

critique: The answer omits that she says social media can help.

critique: The answer should mention that she recommends using social media to combat solitude.

critique: The answer should mention that she recommends using social media to connect with readers.

critique: The answer should mention that Coble says extroverts can use social media to compensate for the solitude.

critique: It misses to mention that some of these writers use social media to counter the isolation they experience as an extrovert.

critique: The text does not say anything about the solitude being the most challenging part of writing.

text: It is omitted that according to Colleen Coble, the most challenging part of writing for those who are extrovert is the solitude.

question: What does the text say about social media?

answer: As the author is a major extrovert, she says that she is the most challenged when trying to be alone writing her books. During those times, she'll use social media as a way to interact with her readers. Social media tends to help her with this goal by readily allowing her to connect with many people who have similar interests. She says that she will make new friends and find awesome support online if she changes her attitude and that she loves Facebook the most because she has instant interaction with her readers.

critique: The answer should mention that the author says that social media is the bane of her existence.

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critique: The response is missing the part about how to interact with social media.

critique: The author doesn't say that she is the most challenged when trying to be alone writing her books. She says that the solitude can take its toll on her mental energy.

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critique: The answer misses to mention that she also says treating blog readers as friends and interacting with them is important as well.

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question: What does the text say about the author?

answer: The author is Colleen Coble. She is a major extrovert and an award-winning author. She has written several novels, and her books have won or finaled in awards ranging from the Best Books of Indiana, the ACFW Carol Award, the Romance Writers of America RITA, the Holt Medallion, the Daphne du Maurier, National Readers' Choice, and the Booksellers Best. She has more than three million books in print and writes romantic mysteries because she loves to see justice prevail. Coble is CEO of American Christian Fiction Writers. She lives with her husband, Dave, in Indiana.

critique: The answer should mention that the author is CEO of American Christian Fiction Writers.

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critique: The answer should mention that the author recommends using social media to connect with readers.

critique: The author is not described as an award-winning author. "She has won or finaled in awards ranging from the Best Books of Indiana, the ACFW Carol Award, the Romance Writers of America RITA, the Holt Medallion, the Daphne du Maurier, National Readers' Choice and the Booksellers Best."

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ERNIE ADAMS (born March 31, 1953) is an American football coach and administrator for the New England Patriots of the National Football League (NFL). He is a longtime friend of head coach Bill Belichick. With Adams, the Patriots have won six Super Bowls. Adams is known for his eccentric personality and low profile, as well as his extremely thorough analysis of the game.[1]

Early years

Adams attended the Dexter School which is located near Boston in Brookline, Massachusetts. Given his knowledge of football for his age, Adams was asked to coach the school's intramural football team as an eighth grader.[2]

He later attended Phillips Academy in Andover, Massachusetts for high school. While there, he had read _Football Scouting Methods_ written by Steve Belichick, who was then a football scout for the United States Naval Academy. In 1970, Steve Belichick's son Bill enrolled at Phillips Academy for a post-graduate year after graduating from Annapolis High School. Adams, a senior, recognized Belichick's name and the two quickly became friends.[3] At one point, they snuck into a Boston College football practice together to practice scouting.[4]

Beginning in 1971, Adams attended Northwestern University in Evanston, Illinois. As a freshman, Adams sought a student assistant position for the Wildcats' football team and secured it after impressing an assistant coach with a report on a football formation.[5] He would serve as a scout for Northwestern until his graduation in 1975 with a degree in education.[6]

Professional career

First stint with Patriots

After his graduation from college, Adams pursued an unpaid position with the New England Patriots in 1975. After contacting then-head coach Chuck Fairbanks numerous times, Adams received a playbook from assistant coach Hank Bullough to learn; Adams learned it in two days, and was presented with another playbook, which he again learned in two days.[7] Adams was hired as an offensive and administrative assistant, and eventually prepared scouting reports for the team, which Fairbanks said were the most thorough he had received in his career.[8]

New York Giants

In 1979, Patriots assistant Ray Perkins was hired to be the head coach of the New York Giants. He promptly hired Adams as an offensive assistant, working with the quarterbacks and receivers. Adams then convinced Perkins to hire Bill Belichick as a special teams coach; Belichick had spent the previous eight years as a student at Wesleyan University and then as an assistant coach for three NFL teams. Adams spent three seasons as the Giants' offensive assistant before moving to their scouting department as their pro personnel director.[9] By 1985, he had become frustrated with that job,[10] and took a lucrative job offer as a municipal bonds trader on Wall Street.[11]

Cleveland Browns

Adams left Wall Street to join the Cleveland Browns in 1991, who had just given Belichick his first NFL head coaching position. Adams was again an offensive assistant, working with tight ends and running backs.[12] However, Belichick was fired by the franchise after the Browns moved to Baltimore and became the Ravens in 1996, and Adams returned to Wall Street, starting his own investment business.[13]

Second stint with Patriots

Belichick got his next head coaching opportunity with the Patriots in 2000. This time, Adams joined the team not as a coach, but as “Football Research Director.” Adams fills a variety of roles for the team. On gamedays, he assists the coaching staff from the press box, advising Belichick on which plays to issue a replay challenge.[14] He also assists the scouting department in preparing for the NFL Draft in the spring, and builds the team's player value chart for the draft.[15] Finally, Adams works on special assignments for the coaching and scouting staffs, which typically involve breaking down game tape.[16] In 2007, as part of Spygate, it was revealed that Adams received tapes from a “third camera” that recorded opponents' defensive signals from a location on the sideline, in violation of a league memo issued by commissioner Roger Goodell. Belichick confirmed this was the case, but said that they were only a small part of the “mosaic” that were the Patriots' offensive game plans at the time.[17]

Adams and Belichick have also been known to have an interest in mathematical analyses of football; Adams once contacted Rutgers University statistics professor Harold Sackrowitz, asking him to evaluate the Patriots' two-point conversion chart following a study by Sackrowitz on the decision.[18][19] Adams also presented Belichick with a study concluding teams punt too often on fourth down.[20]

With the Patriots and throughout his career, Adams is known for keeping a low profile. Former Browns owner Art Modell notably quipped “I'll pay anyone here $10,000 if they can tell me what Ernie Adams does.”[21]

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title: Ernie Adams (American football)

question: What does the story say about Ernie Adams's professional career?

answer: Adams pursued an unpaid position with the New England Patriots in 1975. He was hired as an offensive and administrative assistant, and eventually prepared scouting reports for the team.

critique: The answer omits the rest of Adams's professional career.

critique: The answer should mention his stints with the New York Giants and the Cleveland Browns.

critique: The response doesn't mention that Adams was the head coach of other NFL teams.

critique: It is omitted that he was hired as an offensive and administrative assistant, and eventually prepared scouting reports for the team.

text: It is omitted that he again joined Patriots but as a Football Research Director.

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question: What does the story say about Ernie Adams's education?

answer: Adams attended the Dexter School in Brookline, Massachusetts. He later attended Phillips Academy in Andover, Massachusetts for high school. He then attended Northwestern University in Evanston, Illinois.

critique: The answer omits that Adams graduated from Northwestern with a degree in education.

question: What does the story say about Adams' personal life?

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critique: The text mentions that Adams is known for his eccentric personality and low profile.

text: It should be added that he is a longtime friend of head coach Bill Belichick.


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ALI HASSAN NASSEREDINE (; born 24 January 1983) is a Lebanese former footballer who played as a striker. He played for the Lebanon national team between 2003 and 2006, scoring eight goals in 19 caps.

Coming through from the youth system, Nasseredine made his senior debut for Nejmeh during the 2002–03 season. After eight seasons for the club, with whom he scored 52 league goals, in 2010 Nasseredine moved to cross-city rivals Ansar for one season. The following year, he moved to Jordanian side Al-Jazeera, before joining Bahrain SC in 2012. The same year, he returned to Lebanon, playing one season each for Ansar, Safa, Nabi Chit and Chabab Ghazieh. Nasseredine played his final season in 2016–17 with Safa, ending his career with 76 league goals.

Club career

Nejmeh

On 31 October 1997, Nasseredine was signed to the youth teams of Nejmeh.[1]

When Nejmeh took part in the 2004 AFC Cup Nasseredine had scored a double against Yemen's Al Sha'ab Ibb to win 3–0 in their opening group stage fixture on 11 February 2004. On 6 April 2004, he netted once more in a 3–1 win against Turkmenistan's Nisa Aşgabat as Nejmeh went on to eventually top the group with 16 points. They would meet Syria's Al-Wahda in the quarter-final stages where both teams had scored 4 goals each after the two legs, first losing 2–1 in Damascus following a 3–2 second-leg victory to Nejmeh on 21 September 2004, in which Nasseredine had scored, however, the Syrians advanced on the away goals rule.

The following year saw Nejmeh top their group again in the 2005 AFC Cup where Nasseredine had not scored in the tournament until the quarter-final stages in a 3–2 win against Singapore's Home United FC. on 28 September 2005, as Nejmeh advanced to the semi-final stage, Nasseredine had scored the third goal in a first-leg 3–0 win against Hong Kong's Sun Hei. Two weeks later, on 12 October 2005 Nasseredine had scored again in a 3–2 second-leg victory which saw Nejmeh advance to the final where they would lose 4–2 on aggregate against Jordan's Al-Faisaly Amman. During the 2005–06 Lebanese Premier League season, Ali had finished as the league's leading goal scorer with 17 goals.

In the 2006 edition of the AFC Cup, Nasseredine would score a hat-trick in Nejmeh's opening game, a 6–2 thrashing against Turkmenistan's HTTU Aşgabat[2] on 7 March 2006. On 16 May 2006 Nasseredine would score a 65th minute winning goal in a 2–1 result against Jordan's Al Faisaly which was the final group stage fixture.[3] On 26 September 2006, in the first leg of the semi-finals, Nasseredine had put Nejmeh ahead against Bahrain's Al-Muharraq on 21 minutes, only to end up losing the game 2–1.[4] Nejmeh would then lose 4–2 in the second leg.

In the 2007 AFC Cup, on 20 March 2007 Nasseredine scored an 89th-minute winner in a 2–1 victory against Al-Saqr of Yemen in the second group stage fixture. Nejmeh would finish on top of their group on 15 points, having only lost once.[5] Nejmeh would go all the way to the semi-final's to be knocked out by Jordan's Shabab Al-Ordon Al-Qadisiya.

International career

On 9 June 2004, Nasseredine was substituted on to the field in the 81st minute in a 2006 World Cup qualifier against Maldives, he scored the third and final goal of the 3–0 victory in the 93rd minute.[6] On 8 September 2004 Nasseredine would score a double in Lebanon's 5–2 win against Maldives in their World Cup qualifying second-leg match.[7]

On 13 October 2004 Lebanon would play Korea Republic in their second last game for their group stage clash, Korea only having been 1 point ahead of Lebanon on the group table, the game had been recognised as Lebanon's finest chance of qualifying to the Second round of qualifiers for the first time ever. In front of a sold-out crowd in Beirut's municipal stadium, Korea had scored in the opening goal in the 8th minute. Ali Nasseredine had dramatically equalised on 28 minutes when a back pass was played by a Korean defender, Korea's goal keeper Lee Woon-Jae had received the ball but fumbled which left Nasseredine to pass the ball into an un guarded net.[8] As the game had ended 1–1, the point was not enough which left Lebanon to draw 0–0 in their closing game of the group stage.

On 22 February 2006 Nasseredine had latched onto a free kick to head home an equaliser at 1–1 in the 70th minute in a qualifying match for the 2007 AFC Asian Cup against Kuwait in Beirut.

Honours

Club

NEJMEH

-   Lebanese Premier League: 2003–04, 2004–05, 2008–09
-   Lebanese Elite Cup: 2002, 2003, 2004, 2005
-   Lebanese Super Cup: 2002, 2004, 2009

ANSAR

-   Lebanese Super Cup: 2012

SAFA

-   Lebanese Super Cup: 2013

Individual

AWARDS

-   Lebanese Premier League Goal of the Season: 2014–15

PERFORMANCES

-   Lebanese Premier League top goalscorer: 2005–06

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[4] http://www.the-afc.com/uploads/Documents/competitions/fixtures/1660.pdf

[5] AFC Cup 2007#Group A

[6] https://www.fifa.com/worldcup/archive/germany2006/preliminaries/preliminary=7861/matches/match=36451/report.html

[7] https://www.fifa.com/worldcup/archive/germany2006/preliminaries/preliminary=7861/matches/match=36453/report.html

[8] https://www.fifa.com/worldcup/archive/germany2006/preliminaries/preliminary=7861/matches/match=36455/report.html

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question: Summarize Nasseredine's club career.

answer: He began his career in the youth system of Nejmeh. After eight seasons with the club, he moved to cross-city rivals Ansar for one season. The next year, he moved to Jordanian side Al-Jazeera, and then joined Bahrain SC in 2012. The same year, he returned to Lebanon, playing one season each for Ansar, Safa, Nabi Chit and Chabab Ghazieh. Nasseredine played his final season in 2016-17 with Safa, ending his career with 76 league goals.

critique: It is omitted that he played for Nejmeh from 1997 to 2010.

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critique: "The same year, he returned to Lebanon, playing one season each for Ansar, Safa, Nabi Chit and Chabab Ghazieh. Nasseredine played his final season in 2016-17 with Safa, ending his career with 76 league goals." - this is irrelevant and should be deleted.

critique: The answer omits the years he played for Nejmeh.


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RAY CHEN is a Taiwanese-Australian violinist. He was the first prize winner in the 2008 International Yehudi Menuhin Violin Competition and the 2009 Queen Elisabeth Competition.

Career

Born in Taipei, Taiwan, Chen began learning violin at the age of four. Within five years he completed all 10 levels of the Suzuki Music Education (Suzuki method) in Brisbane, Australia. Chen was invited to play solo with the Queensland Philharmonic Orchestra at the age of eight. He was also invited to perform at the opening celebration concert of the 1998 Winter Olympics in Nagano, Japan.

His violin teachers have included Kerry Smith and Professor Peter Zhang (Sydney Conservatorium). Chen graduated with a bachelor of music degree in violin performance under Aaron Rosand at the Curtis Institute of Music in Philadelphia.

In the summers of 2006 and 2007, Chen attended the Encore School for Strings, studying under David Cerone at the Cleveland Institute of Music. In 2008 he attended the Aspen Music Festival on a full tuition fellowship, studying with Cho-Liang Lin (Juilliard School) and Paul Kantor (Cleveland Institute of Music).

In April 2008 Chen won the senior division first prize of the Yehudi Menuhin International Competition for Young Violinists in Cardiff, Wales. (In 2004 he had won jointly the third prize of the junior division in that competition.[1]) Chen then came to the attention of Maxim Vengerov, who served on the competition jury, and was engaged for performances including debuts with the Mariinsky Theatre Orchestra in Saint Petersburg and at the International Rostropovich Festival with the Azerbaijan State Symphony Orchestra in Baku, under the baton of Vengerov.

Following his success at the Menuhin Competition, Chen won the first prize of the 2009 Queen Elisabeth Competition in Brussels, Belgium, bringing him numerous concert engagements, a recording, and a three-year loan of the “Huggins” Stradivarius from the Nippon Music Foundation. He was the competition's youngest participant. As Grand Prize winner, he was immediately launched on a concert tour, performing with the Royal Flemish Philharmonic (DeFilharmonie) under Jaap van Zweden and Aldert Vermeulen, the National Orchestra of Belgium under Rumon Gamba, and the Luxembourg Philharmonic Orchestra under Emmanuel Krivine, as well as in recitals throughout Belgium.[2]

Chen was signed by Sony Classical in 2010.[3] He has recorded the César Franck Violin Sonata, the violin concertos of Pyotr Ilyich Tchaikovsky and Felix Mendelssohn, and more.

Chen won the Newcomer Award in the 2011 Echo Klassik Awards.[4] He was invited to perform at the annual Nobel Prize Concert in 2012, playing Max Bruch's Violin Concerto in G minor with the Royal Stockholm Philharmonic Orchestra.[5]

In April 2016, he was the youngest juror ever of the Yehudi Menuhin International Competition for Young Violinists in London, with Pamela Frank, Joji Hattori, Martin Engstroem, Ning Feng, Julia Fischer, Dong-Suk Kang, Tasmin Little and Jeremy Menuhin.[6]

After the short-term loan of “Huggins”, he was lent the 1715 “Joachim” Stradivarius from the Nippon Music Foundation until 2019. As of October 2019, he is the recipient of the 1735 “Samazeuilh” Stradivarius loaned by the Nippon Music Foundation.[7]

Chen is also known for his online presence. He has created videos on his eponymous YouTube channel pertaining to violin playing, and has collaborated multiple times with the YouTube classical musicians comedy duo TwoSetViolin.[8]

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question: How many prizes and awards have Ray Chen won so far in his career?

answer: So far, Chen has won 3 prizes and awards. He won the senior division first prize at the 2008 International Yehudi Menuhin Violin Competition, the first prize of the 2009 Queen Elisabeth Competition, and the Newcomer Award in the 2011 Echo Klassik Awards.

critique: The answer omits Chen's first prize of the junior division at the 2008 International Yehudi Menuhin Violin Competition.

question: Why was Chen loaned a Stradivarius so many times?

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critique: It is not necessarily true that it does not to answer the question because the article does mention it.


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My father (Walter) married Darcy in 1992 after six months of acquaintance, at the terrifying prospect of dying alone. In 2007 Walter O’Driscoll bought a dog and formed a stronger companionship with it than that of the one with his wife. The dog had anxiety problems and would incessantly vomit regardless of location or time. It was this trait coupled with the purchase of a new entryway rug that drove Mrs. O’Driscoll to get rid of the dog, and it was this that drove Walter to burn down the house with her inside. This story is true.

Walter was 61 years old come September. He worked at a company that sold cleaning products which, yes, is as boring as it sounds. But Walter didn’t mind boring. You see, a belief he’d held onto since he was a teen was that doing boring things is like meditating. And so he did so for nine hours a day. And then he would continue being bored well after he got home until he went to bed (in a separate room from his wife’s), and he would read a boring book, and then dream boring dreams (sometimes of reading boring books), and then wake up and eat (boring) breakfast.

Life was predictable for Walter. One day while reading the paper, he realized he had been living his life in the future; when he was driving to work, he imagined himself already at work, packaging cleaning product, and when he got to work it was exactly what he expected. While he was packaging cleaning product, he was thinking about watching television with his dog. In fact, for an old man with so little future ahead of him, he spent an unusually large amount of time thinking about it.

The only time that Walter wasn’t hyper-aware of his boredom and thinking about the future was when he was sitting in his chair watching TV, his dog in his lap. After a couple episodes of whatever was on television, it ran off to some other part of the house. Walter wasn’t alone in his chair for long when Darcy’s shrill, French voice preceded her entry into the living room.

“That damn dog puked on the cahpet!” she said, each angry word bleeding into the next. She said more things but he turned on the subtitles for the TV and feigned deafness until she stomped off ranting about the poor little dog.

A week later he arrived home from work to Darcy walking briskly out of the house yelling. Her attempts to make herself heard were futile as Walter had the windows up so that all that penetrated the glass were muffled bass notes. He stepped out of the car.

“- Rug again. Get rid of that dog! Get rid of it-” he tuned her out again.

That night he sat in his chair with his dog in his lap, watching whatever on TV. Dinner was boring, just as he expected. In bed, he dreamed of working in the factory.

The next day, he went to work, just as previously described, and worked all day, just as he’d imagined the night before. When he got home, things began to veer off from their normal path. Darcy didn’t come out to meet him in the driveway to complain today. In fact, the house was eerily quiet, although he couldn’t quite place what it was that was so different. When he got to the door, he realized what it was- the dog wasn’t barking. He stepped inside. Darcy was standing in the kitchen with her hands on her hips.

“You were taking too long to get rid of the dog so I did.”

He didn’t listen anymore, rather walked to his chair and watched TV.

She complained about other things, but the complaints fell on falsely deaf ears.

That night, instead of going to bed, he stayed up awhile. The orange glow from the lamps throughout the house reflected off the windows making it impossible to see outside. The TV had been off for some time. When Darcy’s cruel snoring came through the walls, he made his way downstairs and dug through little odds and ends until he found a can of mogas. He took it upstairs with him and poured it all through the house, making extra sure to douse the entryway rug, and the area outside her Darcy’s bedroom door, then lit a match and dropped it on the trail.

As he made his way back to his room he reflected on all of his life spent in boredom. He did not regret it, but he was tired now. He could hear the crackling of the flames growing louder and louder, and eventually, the shrill calls of the woman to whom he was married. He entered his bedroom, which was, again, not shared with his wife. Walter pulled his slippers off his feet and lay down in his small bed. The house was getting hotter, and with every second he lay there he became more tired, then he fell asleep.

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question: Summarize the main conflict of the story.

answer: The conflict is that Walter has formed a stronger bond with his dog than with his wife. The dog has anxiety problems and will vomit on a new rug his wife bought, which starts their relationship off on the wrong foot. The dog then continues to vomit, and Walter's wife tells him to get rid of it. Instead, Walter sets the house on fire while they are in it.

critique: The story does not state that the dog will continue to vomit.

critique: The answer should mention that Walter burns down the house with his wife in it.

critique: The summary is undeniably true, but it would benefit from a touch of conciseness.

critique: The answer should include the fact that Walter burns down the house because he is angry about his wife getting rid of the dog.

question: What does the story say about Walter's wife?

answer: Walter's wife is named Darcy. She married Walter in 1992 after six months of acquaintance, at the terrifying prospect of dying alone. In 2007, she got rid of the dog because it had anxiety problems and would incessantly vomit regardless of location or time. This drove Walter to burn down the house with her inside.

critique: "In 2007, she got rid of the dog because it had anxiety problems and would incessantly vomit regardless of location or time. This drove Walter to burn down the house with her inside." - this is incorrect. The dog was sold to someone else and Walter burned down the house with his wife inside because she got rid of the dog.

critique: It's omitted that Walter's wife is French.

critique: The answer should mention that Walter's wife is French.

critique: "at the terrifying prospect of dying alone" is irrelevant.

critique: "ance" should be replaced with "anxiety" because the original text was both British English-English, and American English.

text: The one that was terrified of the prospect of dying alone was Walter, not Darcy.

category: accuracy

question: What does the story say about how to achieve a happy marriage?

answer: No answer

critique: The story does not mention how to achieve a happy marriage.


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He had always looked at his hands as if they were sand in torrential rain. He felt the fragility of them weigh heavy upon his efforts, each attempt to grasp something substantial was counteracted by the necessity to shake, endlessly. It had begun on his seventh birthday and the doctors were reluctant to diagnose him with anything concrete, but even at that age Taylor knew he was unique, but not in the sense of an intricately designed snowflake, rather unique like a discarded necklace. Sure, there was sentiment and meaning at the very heart of him, but now, at the age of twelve, that had been substantially crushed by the sheer force behind the flaws on display.
His father was a mechanic, his steady hands and muscular frame were a source of pride that Taylor knew was unachievable. At night Taylor was unable to put himself to bed, the frustration of tucking himself under his duvet was too much of a hassle, it was task usually reserved for his father and his grease-ridden hands. He could no longer fall asleep without the smell of engine oil seeping through the sheets and leaving a temporary print on his chest, like the warm embrace of a hug he had not known for several years.
At night he would dream of planting his feet firmly into soil, like an abundant oak weathering a storm, no motions or quaking. As the storms would recede, the sun would clamber over the clouds and leave the world in a cigarette-stained hue, slowly an individual snowflake would fall upon Taylor’s face and melt gently into his flesh. Arms spread wide, Taylor could fly, he could match the birds for all their grace and chase the sunset. These dreams were swiftly becoming the only reason Taylor still found reason to live. At twelve he had already seen the splendour of grass on the other side, at twelve he was already awaiting death.
It was three days shy of his thirteenth birthday when he first began to find balance a troublesome conquest. He seemed inebriated without any of the mental occurrences, as if his legs had found a rundown bar whilst his brain slept. Taylor swelled with fear, he knew it wouldn’t be long before his whole body found the bar and dragged his brain along for the ride.
On his thirteenth birthday, Taylor received no cards or a cake, his father had taken the day off but spent the morning quietly staring at the unplugged TV. Taylor attempted to scream and shout at him, but the words wouldn’t come, there were no sounds; his mind had thrown out its dictionary and removed its microphone. Taylor attempted to grab his father but his body fought every urge to even walk towards him and collapsed under its own weight. He sat alone in the corner of the kitchen, back pressed against the washing machine. The spin cycle matched the beating of his heart.
Taylor’s father eventually stood, slowly walked towards him and grasped him into his arms, they no longer smelt soaked in oil, instead Taylor could smell the sea. Azure waves crashed within his head as his father pressed his hands to his ears, Taylor could hear the crabs fight, he could hear the cliff edges crumble, he could hear the sun pierce the ocean’s foam. He closed his eyes and drifted to sleep, there were no wings, storms or snowflakes this time, just Taylor alone in an empty room with no windows or doors, somebody had scrawled on the wall ‘Godzilla awaits outside’ in large blue ink.
Taylor awoke suddenly to the sound of crashing waves, yet his father was nowhere to be seen. He was on a beach, bucket and spade beside him, children all around building sandcastles. He looked behind him and noticed his father sat on a sandy dune, he called for Taylor to build. Taylor turned to the kid barely three meters from him, his hands were so steady, Taylor hands were a shipwreck compared to the other children’s calm seas.
He took great care and caution in filling his bucket, his hands spilled sand in various directions but Taylor cared little, he paid attention only to the incessant task of gently patting down each small amount that did make it into the bucket. The tide edged close, grabbing at sand with each furtive effort towards Taylor and the other children, some panicked and hastily filled their buckets, others carried on with little acknowledgment of the water.
When Taylor has filled his bucket, he attempted to lift it, but found it too heavy. His weak arms were like sugar in a hot tea, they barely moved before lactic acid tore his body apart, the strain too much. His father called for him to turn the bucket, to finish the job at hand. With great concentration, Taylor envisioned his feet as the roots of the great oak of his dreams, he had Godzilla’s strength and wings bloomed from his back. Taylor stood tall and lifted the bucket a few inches of the ground, with an enormous effort he turned it and placed it upon the sand, barely seconds after it had landed he lifted it again. His sandcastle stood proud.
That night the children sat with their parents and watched as nature took their sandcastles apart. Taylor’s father told him how the amount remaining directly corresponded with the level of happiness they would have as an adult. The pharmaceutical companies pitched stalls at the beaches exit selling various anti-depressants, as their child’s sandcastle fell the parents would rush to the stalls with huge sums of money, to stock up for the troubles ahead.
“Your mother’s castle fell instantly as a child,” Taylor’s father told him, “she hadn’t packed the sand and the wind took it before night had even begun. Mine lasted a few hours, and never completely fell, but enough was destroyed.”
Taylor’s castle never fell, it remained intact. By fourteen he regained his balance, by fifteen his muscles were almost at the same level as his classmates, by sixteen he was pretty much cured.
He never stopped shaking.

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Summary

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Flagship Silver Muse heralds a new era of luxury

Our Flexibility Promise

With our Flexibility Promise, you can change the date and/or destination of your Wexas holiday up to 35 days before departure, free of charge. Book by 31st December 2020 for travel completed by 31st August 2021.

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Ship Tonnage
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Ocean cruise

Having made her maiden voyage in April 2017, Silver Muse redefines ultra-luxury ocean travel, enhancing the small-ship intimacy and spacious all-suite accommodations that are the hallmarks of the Silversea experience.

Butler-served suites, many with private verandahs and all with ocean views, are designed with comfort in mind, BVLGARI bath amenities and pillow menus among a whole host of luxurious features. Meanwhile, six sumptuous dining venues showcase menus ranging from gourmet lobster to theatrical teppanyaki as open-air bars allow you to embrace life at sea with the finest views.

There’s also a spa, pool deck and Jacuzzi for relaxing between ports, while the ship's enrichment programme provides expert insight into the history, culture and cuisine of each port, with everything from guest lectures to wine tastings. Elsewhere, there’s the chance to enjoy full-scale productions in the Venetian Lounge, or sip cocktails at Dolce Vita, an Italian-inspired lounge with a live pianist.

Cabins and Deck Plans

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Vista Suite

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The Vista Suite provides generous living space for all travellers. The Vista Suite offers all the comfort and attention to detail that you can expect aboard. A generous expanse of interior comforts — elegant décor, stunning marble bathroom and ample seating area, make this a cosy home away from home. The seating area of the Vista Suite has plenty of room to relax, while large picture windows frame panoramic ocean views, the perfect backdrop for breakfast in bed.

Classic Veranda Suite

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The Classic Veranda Suite provides generous living space for voyagers. Located lower bow, the Classic Veranda Suite offers all the comfort and attention to detail that you can expect aboard — both inside and out. A generous expanse of interior comforts — elegant décor, stunning marble bathroom and ample seating area, make this a cosy home away from home. But perhaps this suite’s finest asset lies just outside, as floor-to-ceiling glass doors open onto a private veranda, making every sunset feel as if it is yours alone.

Superior Veranda Suite

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Located on the upper deck, and offering spectacular sunset views, the Superior Veranda Suite has all the comforts and luxury that you can expect aboard. A comfortable living space, attention to detail and a generous expanse of amenities, this stunning suite makes for a cosy home while on the seas. But perhaps this suite’s finest asset lies just outside, as floor-to-ceiling glass doors open onto a private veranda, making every sunset feel as if it is yours alone.

Deluxe Veranda Suite

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The Deluxe Veranda Suite offers a comfortable living space, close to the heart of the ship. With its preferred mid-ship location and all the comfort and attention to detail that you can expect aboard, the Deluxe Veranda Suite is the savvy traveller’s paradise— both inside and out. Elegant décor, stunning marble bathroom and ample seating area, make this a cosy home away from home. But perhaps this suite’s finest asset lies just outside, as floor-to-ceiling glass doors open onto a private veranda, making every sunset feel as if it is yours alone.

Silver Suite

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Step onto your terrace and bask in the calm feeling of the ocean breeze. Dissolve into the comfort of your king size bed. Prepare for the evening in the beautiful marble bathroom. The upper deck location gives the most spectacular of sea views, the spacious living area allows for comfortable relaxing where cosy nights in become veritable experiences in themselves. The two-bedroom configuration of this suite makes this it the ideal option for families.

Royal 1 Suite

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Designed with the values of the culture of living in mind, the Royal Suite offers a vast, eloquent space. Precise lines, authentic Italian craftsmanship and fine materials make up just some of the details of this stunning suite. Commanding and majestic, the Royal Suite boasts a lavish living area perfect for entertaining, plush interior furnishings and sweeping seascapes from the private terrace. The comfort of the spacious apartment makes this the ideal space for those wanting to feel the true comfort and luxury of the Silversea philosophy.

Grand 1 Suite

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Indulge in the epitome of ultra-luxury cruising. The Grand Suite is for those who want to experience sailing in style. The sophistication of the Silversea philosophy coupled with ample interior and exterior space makes this the perfect choice for serious travellers. With the biggest verandas on board, enjoy entertaining new friends or simply sharing intimate meals while contemplating spectacular sunsets. Savour the sense of well-being offered by the luxurious furnishings and modern amenities. Offering an unprecedented level of relaxation, the Grand Suite is the perfect romantic getaway.

Owner's 1 Suite

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Picture yourself taking a delicious breakfast on your private veranda. Imagine watching the sun set, a flute of chilled champagne in hand, setting sail for your next destination. Prestigious, classic and sophisticated, this stylish apartment suite offers the ultimate in finest accommodation on board. Set aside for those who seek a superlative level of space, comfort and service, the Owner’s Suite has it all. The adjoining bedroom, with its en-suite bathroom, offers its own spectacular sea views.

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HANK HANEY (born August 24, 1955) is an American professional golf instructor best known for coaching Tiger Woods[1] and two-time major championship winner Mark O'Meara. A graduate of the University of Tulsa, Haney owns and operates four teaching facilities in the Dallas, Texas area.

Biography

Haney says, “My philosophy as a teacher is to teach my students to become their own best teacher by getting them to understand the flight of the golf ball and how it relates to the swing, with emphasis on swinging the golf club on their own correct swing plane”.[2]

In 2008, Haney started working with former NBA star and current NBA analyst Charles Barkley on the Golf Channel's _The Haney Project: Charles Barkley_, an attempt to fix Barkley's bad swing. Haney's show continued in 2010, this time with comedian Ray Romano. The third season, in 2011, featured talk radio host Rush Limbaugh. Series 4 (2012) featured a four-player shootout in Mario Batali, Adam Levine of Maroon 5, Sugar Ray Leonard, and Angie Everhart. Series 5, to debut in 2013, features all-time winner of the most Olympic medals, Michael Phelps.

On Monday, May 10, 2010, one day after Woods withdrew in the final round of The Players Championship, and after an almost 6-year relationship, Haney informed Woods that he would no longer be his coach.[3] Haney published “The Big Miss”, a book detailing his time with Woods, two years later.[4]

Haney has a video game of his own, _Hank Haney's World Golf_, that was released for Windows on November 16, 2010.[5] A Mac OS X version was released under the name _World Challenge Golf 2011_ by Virtual Programming on September 28, 2011.[6]

Suspension

On May 30, 2019 Haney was suspended from his PGA Tour show on SiriusXM Radio following disparaging comments he made on air about the Ladies Professional Golf Association (LPGA) that were viewed as racist and sexist. On his Sirius XM PGA Tour Radio show May 29, 2019, with the 74th United States Women's Open Championship beginning the next day at the Country Club of Charleston, Haney suggested he had no idea the tournament was about to start and asked where it would be held. Haney further claimed that he could not name even six players on the LPGA tour, and that if pressed to predict who would win, he said it would be a Korean named Lee, since there were so many. Later in the interview Haney disparaged the second edition of the U.S. Senior Women's Open sponsored by the USGA two weeks earlier at Pine Needles Lodge and Golf Club in Southern Pines, N.C. Before the end of the show, Haney was alerted that his remarks were being taken as sexist and racist, and while claiming not to be racist, nevertheless apologized. He also apologized later via Twitter.[7][8] The following day Haney's show was dropped from SiriusXM's schedule and it was later announced that he had been suspended from the SiriusXM PGA TOUR Radio channel at the PGA Tour's instruction. SiriusXM announced that it was also reviewing Haney's status with the station.[9][10][11] This led to a mini war of words between Woods and Haney after the former voiced support for this decision during The Memorial on May 31, saying that his former coach “obviously said what he meant, and he got what he deserved”.[12] Haney responded on June 4 tweeting his amazement that Woods “has become the moral authority on issues pertaining to women” and that, additionally to being a multi-time major champion, he must now also believe himself to be a mind reader because never in the 6 years of coaching him did Woods hear him “utter one racist or sexist word”.[13] On June 2, 2019, 4 days after Haney's prediction, South Korean professional golfer Lee Jeong-eun won the 2019 U.S. Women's Open.

Awards

-   World Golf Teachers Hall of Fame - 2019
-   Texas Golf Hall of Fame - 2014
-   PGA Teacher of the Year (USA) - 1993
-   PGA “Harvey Penick Award for Teaching Excellence” - 1984
-   North Texas PGA Section “Teacher of the Year” - 1989, 1990, 1991, 1992, 1993
-   North Texas PGA Section “Horton Smith Award” - 1990
-   North Texas PGA Metro Chapter “Horton Smith Award” - 1991, 1992
-   Gulf Coast PGA Chapter “Teacher of the Year” - 1984
-   Federazione Italiana Golf “Top Teacher” - 1989, 1990
-   NCAA Division I District 6 Golf Coach of the Year - 1998
-   _Golf Digest_ Top 25 Teacher, 1984 - 1992
-   _Golf Digest_ Top 10 Teacher, 1993 - 1999
-   _Golf Digest_ Number 4 Teacher, 2000, 2002
-   _Golf Digest_ Number 6 Teacher - 2001
-   _Golf Digest_ Number 5 Teacher - 2003, 2004
-   _Golf Magazine_ Top 100 Teacher, 1984 - 2004
-   _Golf World's_ Top 50 Golf Personalities Worldwide - 2000
-   _D Magazine_ (Dallas) “The Best of Dallas” - “Best Golf Instructor” - 2003[14]

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AHMED IBN MUHAMMAD IBN KHALIFA () was the progenitor of the ruling Al Khalifa family of Bahrain and the first monarch or _hakim_ of Bahrain. All of the Al Khalifa monarchs of Bahrain are descendants of Ahmed ibn Muhammad ibn Khalifa. He is commonly referred to as AHMED AL-FATEH (Ahmed the Conqueror) for conquering Bahrain.

Early life

Ahmed ibn Muhammed ibn Khalifa was born in Kuwait in the first half of the 18th century.

Siege of Zubarah 1783

When Nasr Al-Madhkur – whom the Zands had appointed as Bahrain's governor – besieged Zubara in 1783, he was defeated and driven away by an army under the command of Ahmed ibn Muhammad ibn Khalifa,[1] who continued his victories and conquered Bahrain in 1783 AD.[2][3]

Reign

Shaikh Ahmed, through his successful conquest of Bahrain in 1783, restored Bahrain’s Arab independence and sovereignty. Shaikh Ahmed was based in Al Zubarah on the Qatari Peninsula, an enclave and city state his father built after his departure from Kuwait. Shaikh Ahmed appointed a keeper, Ajaj, whose descendants still live in Bahrain, to Bahrain’s Al Diwan Fort. He appointed a relation, Ali bin Faris to govern Bahrain on his behalf. As for his former opponent, Nasir ibn Madhkur who had blockaded Al Zubarah the previous year, he allowed him to sail back to Bushire in Persia without any harm.

Shaikh Ahmed used to spend the winter in Zubarah, but the spring and summer in Bahrain. The famous hunting ground where Shaikh Ahmed used to hunt, was named “Jari Al Shaikh Ahmed” in his honor. Though the former hunting ground is currently an affluent and popular residential neighborhood in Bahrain’s Southern Governorate, it still carries Shaikh Ahmed’s name.

Shaikh Ahmed had proposed while in Qatar to build a canal to separate the Qatari peninsula from the mainland of the Arabian Peninsula in an attempt to prevent Wahhabi control of Bahrain and Qatar. At the time, the Wahhabi movement was slowly gaining momentum in Nejd or Central Arabia and Shaikh Ahmed was vigilant to protect his territories from foreign control.

Death and burial

Shaikh Ahmed died during the summer of 1795, reportedly after a severe heart attack he had after finishing his afternoon meal he used to consumed after the afternoon prayers. He was buried in Manama next to a well known grave of a pious religious scholar. He will be known for his conquest of Bahrain and his alliance with Bahraini and Qatari tribes in consolidating power and to deter external interventions.

Children

He had five children: Abdulla, Salman, Mohamed and Yousif. His only known daughter, Amna bint Ahmed, was married to Rashid Al Fadhil, a distant relation of Shaikh Ahmed. Her son, Abdulrahman Al Fadhel, later a played a crucial role in Bahrain’s history by regaining Bahrain after it was briefly occupied by the Wahhabis in around 1809.

[1] Shaikh Hamad Bin Isa Al-Khalifa ,First Light: Modern Bahrain and its Heritage, 1994 p41

[2] Precis Of Turkish Expansion On The Arab Littoral Of The Persian Gulf And Hasa And Katif Affairs. By J. A. Saldana; 1904, I.o. R R/15/1/724

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The CALIFORNIA HOUSING FINANCE AGENCY (CALHFA), established in 1975, is an independent California state agency within the California Department of Housing and Community Development that makes low-rate housing loans through the sale of taxable and tax exempt bonds.[1][2]

History

CalHFA was created by the Zenovich–Moscone–Chacon Housing and Home Finance Act of 1975, which also permanently established and reorganized the California Department of Housing and Community Development.[3]

Known until 2002 as CHFA (commonly pronounced “cha-fuh”), CalHFA was rebranded “to keep pace with our expanding audience and the growing needs of the affordable housing marketplace” and “to elevate CalHFA’s profile on all key fronts.”[4][5]

Historically, CalHFA has provided housing assistance in three areas: below-market interest rate mortgages and downpayment assistance for first-time homebuyers, most of whom were low- and moderate income families and ethnic minorities not well-served by market rate products, insurance for single-family home purchase mortgages, and loans for the development of multifamily rental housing. These financial products were funded through sale of revenue bonds secured by the mortgage products and the underlying property. The operating costs of the agency are paid by origination and service fees, and the difference between the interest paid on outstanding debt and the interest charged on the loans made. Beginning in 2002, passage of Proposition 46 (2002) provided funding for additional activities through sale of general obligation bonds.[6] This source of funding was extended by passage of Proposition 1C (2006).[7][8]

In 2014, the CalHFA board voted to expand first mortgage eligibility to non-first-time homebuyers.

Structure

The Single Family Division provides low interest rate home financing to low to moderate income homebuyers in California, as well as down payment and closing cost assistance.[9]

The Multifamily Programs division provides permanent financing for the acquisition, rehabilitation, and preservation or new construction of rental housing that includes affordable rents for low and moderate income families and individuals.[10]

The Asset Management Division is responsible for the management of agency-financed multifamily rental developments, where each project is monitored regarding its financial, physical and occupancy compliance with various regulations in California.[11]

Programs

The CalPLUS loan programs feature a CalHFA fixed interest rate first mortgage, insured either through FHA or on the conventional market. This loan is fully amortized for a 30-year term and is combined with the CalHFA Zero Interest Program (ZIP) for down payment assistance.

The Cal EEM + Grant combines an FHA Energy Efficient Mortgage with an additional 4% grant to help homebuyers improve their home with energy-efficient upgrades.

The California Homebuyer’s Downpayment Assistance Program (CHDAP) offers a deferred-payment subordinate loan amount of (3%) of the purchase price of appraised value, whichever is less, to be used for down payment and/or closing costs.

The Extra Credit Teacher Home Purchase Program (ECTP) is intended for eligible teachers, administrators, classified employees and staff members working in high priority schools in California. Offers a deferred-payment junior loan of an amount not to exceed the greater of $7,500 or 3% of the sales price or in CalHFA-defined high cost areas an amount not to exceed the greater of $15,000 or 3% of the sales price. Assistance can be used for down payment.

The Mortgage Credit Certificate Tax Credit Program (MCC) is a federal credit which can reduce potential federal income tax liability, creating additional net spendable income which borrowers may use toward their monthly mortgage payment. This MCC Tax Credit program may enable first-time homebuyers to convert a portion of their annual mortgage interest into a direct dollar for dollar tax credit on their U.S. individual income tax returns.

Operations

CalHFA is authorized to administer the activities of the California Housing Finance Fund, the California Housing Loan Insurance Fund, and two state general obligation bond funds.[12] CalHFA has $6.8 billion in assets that are mainly loan receivables and investments related to bond proceeds.[13]

CalHFA is a statutorily independent agency and component unit of state government, and is not subject to Budget Act appropriation.[14] Budget information for CalHFA is displayed within that of the Department of Housing and Community Development.[15]

Down Payment Assistance programs are all different with certain requirements for each. State or local housing authorities, a non-profit organization, or lender usually set the requirements and conditions for the DPA program. Some programs require you or your loan officer to take a short course on Down Payment Assistance for first time home buyers.[16]

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We know everyone is concerned about the COVID-19 outbreak and the impacts the virus may have on our daily lives. We take the health and safety of our customers, staff, and community very seriously. As such, we are taking precautions to do our part in mitigating the spread of COVID-19. We are continuing to provide service and we are confident that our facilities and practices are safe. We are following the Health Department and Center for Disease Control (CDC) guidelines relating to COVID-19. We are being extra vigilant with maintaining a sanitary environment in our facilities and ensuring we have what is needed to stay healthy. In addition to sanitizing surfaces regularly throughout the day and encouraging good handwashing practices (a great practice all the time, not just during an outbreak!), we are also wearing gloves while packing orders as an extra level of protection.

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Last updated on Aug 4, 2020

*****PLEASE READ***** COMING SOON +++++SAMPLES OF OUR PRODUCT
We value our customers and aim to meet our customers expectations and needs. Due to COVID-19, some items displayed and photos presented in our shop may be different than what you receive due to available supplies from our vendors.

We know everyone is concerned about the COVID-19 outbreak and the impacts the virus may have on our daily lives. We take the health and safety of our customers, staff, and community very seriously. As such, we are taking precautions to do our part in mitigating the spread of COVID-19. We are continuing to provide service and we are confident that our facilities and practices are safe. We are following the Health Department and Center for Disease Control (CDC) guidelines relating to COVID-19. We are being extra vigilant with maintaining a sanitary environment in our facilities and ensuring we have what is needed to stay healthy. In addition to sanitizing surfaces regularly throughout the day and encouraging good handwashing practices (a great practice all the time, not just during an outbreak!), we are also wearing gloves while packing orders as an extra level of protection.

Our bath bombs DO NOT have the ingredients or the combinations of the ingredients that leads to infections. Our Products are made with all natural organic ingredients, no chemicals added. In addition, we do not use clay or corn starch in our bath bombs, so there is no risk of infections. We only touch our products once and gloves are warn as well as when we make our bath bombs. Our products are for MEN, WOMEN, BOYS, and GIRLS. We also have product for Babies too!

UPDATE: WE ARE ALMOST FINISH WITH THIS PROJECT. You may have noticed that we changed our logo and brand; therefore, we are slowly replacing our photos to reflect the new look. You will see some photos with old look and the product may arrive with the new look.

With every order you get a 20% off coupon code. OFFER: if you make more purchases and referrals you will be eligible for bigger discounts with future purchases and offers. THE MORE YOU BUY THE MORE REWARDS!!!

Join our FACEBOOK GROUP "Bath and Body by HeartNSoul"
To get new product announcements and demos, promo codes, exclusive product sales and discount.

question: What is the purpose of the announcement?

answer: The company is informing its customers about COVID-19 and how the company is trying to mitigate the problem. The company is also informing its customers their products are made with all-natural organic ingredients, no chemicals are added, and the company does not use clay or corn starch in their bath bombs.

critique: The answer should mention the discount coupon.

critique: The answer should mention that the company is also providing coupons.

critique: The answer is not a summary of the passage.

critique: The answer should mention the discount offer.

critique: It's about the effect of the current natural disaster on their supplies and their product

critique: The answer should mention the coupon code.

question: What kinds of products does the group sell?

answer: Bath bombs.

critique: The answer should include that the products are for men, women, boys and girls.

critique: Replace with the more-detailed response of, "bath bombs, made with all-natural, organic ingredients, and not containing items such as clay and corn starch (which can be a potential for sepsis and related infections)."

question: What kinds of customers are the products targeted to?

answer: The products are targeted to men, women, boys, and girls.


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Strange Encounters

"It's weird officer, real weird." Mark Henderson was at the local police station in Alberton, Ontario on 4: 36am August 8th, 1951. Strangely enough, a building he's never seen, in a town he's never been to before, yet familiar.

"All right smooth talker, let's take it from the top once more. I know there's not much to it as you've continued to repeat but let's see if anything else pops out at you and then we will pay for your gas home." Officer Dan Richardson was becoming more and more tired with the story was hearing.

There just can't be anyway. Dan thought becoming more and more enraged within. The moment he walks out of here I'm just going to throw this case out. Hocus pocus my ass, what does he take me for, an idiot?! At best this is the best damn way to get free gas.

"Well like I said before, I had just filled up at half past 10pm, so I could drive out and get to the place that sells tobacco by the pound still..."

Yes, yes we all go out to New Market for cheaper cigarettes, not relevant.

"...and I was driving out to Bakersfield like I said,"
He didn't refer to it as Bakersfield before? The puzzled Officer thought.

"...on the way there I had to swerved out of the way of a truck with these god forsaken bright lights. I guess I was a bit sleepy Officer and woke up in the nick of time but after that I found myself just driving around an unfamiliar road.

I was having awful headaches, for a bit around that time too. Images that started accompanying them are hard to distinguish but almost always included me in a white setting... I don't know it sounds crazy now. Anyways, I pulled over till they subsided and drove straight here in hopes that you could help me figure out where I am so I can get home, but I still can't remember where that was again. Some rest will cure this forgetfulness. I feel like I've been up all night." Mark felt like that was all the information that he could give, he couldn't remember what town he lived in nor his wife or his phone number. He kind of felt a helpless feeling fall over him.

"We'll now that you've told us where you were driving to we can call that regions station and see if there is a match to your name anywhere close to there. It should only take a few hours."

Not long after that another Office came into the room and asked if Officer Dan could speak with him for a moment.
What did the results turn up Frank?

"He wasn't lying when he said things were weird. It turns out that there isn't  even a Bakersfeild anywhere near here. In fact, you have to drive 14 hours north to get to a small town called Bakersfeild." Officer Frank said as he started to debrief.

"...here's where things get truly disturbing. When we searched his name through the local police department Mark has a missing person out because his wife...."

"Wow, his wife sure gets worried quickly. Seems a bit much don't you think he's only been gone for half a day at most. Can't remember his name or town he lives in, probably doesn't remember setting out on a road trip. Likely to get away from her if she's that crazy." Office Dan remarked crudely as if this was all an elaborate funny joke.

"If you'd let me finish, his wife reported him missing August 8th, 1950, sir. This was reported after she spent a full day returning home from a place that was 8 hours away from their town. She reported being in the passenger seat of a driverless car after being at a gas station for an unknown reason. All she could remember before waking up was that there was a blinding white light that she couldn't help but look at. It actually says 'forced' in the report." Frank said growing more and grimmer as he read from the file between his trembling hands.

Officer Dan, started to sit in the closest seat he could find. He couldn't believe that Mark was 14 hours away from home. That would make his whole time scale false. Not to mention the fact that he has been missing for a full year, a full year exactly he would later realize.

He began to think about the crazy aspects of them all, his wife's story at the time; driverless cars, being at a gas station for no reason, it all makes sense now, only after hearing Marks story.

"Sir there is one more thing in the reports." Frank said with a grave look in his eyes.

"What more could it be?"

"The wife had three cuts into her skin going the length of her back; she said that's the first appearance  of them in her life. It was like they were skillfully cut as the doctors said there was no way any doctor could stitch a cut that clean without some kind of pain. She reported none."

"All right Frank thanks for all the intel." Dan has a hard enough time giving gratitude in the first place and was finding it particularly challenging to give it with what he just learned.

The door opens to the interrogation; with it brought an energy that mimetic death. Officer Dan began relaying the frightening news to Mark, which still hasn't sunk in, himself.
"One last thing before we send you on your way home to your wife, if you will Mark. Your wife reported three cuts on her back that she had never seen before that night. Could you remove your shirt and pants please, I just want to know if we should have medical look at you first." Officer Dan asked Mark in the most genuine and sincere way he could.

"No problem Sir, it was starting to itch a bit anyways. It'll be nice to readjust it." Mark said in a cheerful way. For he sees this all as a blessing. Finally, he can see his wife and start the laughing process.

As Office Dan brought his coffee cup down from a big deep, delicious gulp, the liquid left his mouth as fast as it came in. in one fellow motion Office Dan vomited, dropped his cup, and tripped on his own two feet.

With his eyes wide open from shock; he gazed at a man whose skin, from head to toe, was scalped. Only his muscles were visible. Each and every muscle strand picked clean of its protective layer of skin. No blood was seeping through, it was as if there was its own invisible skin that covered him. Which is likely why he hasn't miraculously died.

As Mark turned around to confront a mirror, the last thing to pass through his mind was his beautiful wife; he pictured the way her soft cherry red hair flowed over her shoulders like a creek over an edge. Her rosy cheeks gently glowing in the sun. It was comforting to his mind to have such a lovely mental image cross it because once his  eyes focused on the mirror, his hideously deformed body sent his body into a trauma that it couldn't handle and  at  10:29PM August 8th Mark Henderson collapsed dead.

As for Dan Richardson, well he wishes that the story ended there.

title: [SF] Strange Encounters

question: Summarize the source of tension in the story.

answer: At the beginning of the story, a man named Mark shows up at the police station with nobody having any idea of where he came from or why he is there. He seems disoriented, but appears to hold on to his identity, at least at the beginning. As he tells his story, it's revealed that he stated getting lost three years earlier. It appears his wife was in the car with him at that time, as she reported a similar scenario, however, she was missing for a year.

critique: The answer is incorrect. Mark was missing for a year, not three years.

critique: It is omitted that when Officer Dan questions the man to remove his shirt and reveals that he is missing his skin. (And metal rods are instead what supports his muscles.)

critique: The response inaccurately mentions that Mark's wife was missing for three years, however it was only a year.

critique: The answer is incorrect. Mark's wife was not in the car with him three years ago. She was in the car with him the night he disappeared.

critique: This is incorrect. The woman was missing for a year and the story happened in 1951, not three years earlier.

critique: The story does not state that Mark stated getting lost three years earlier.

critique: The story does not state that Mark got lost three years earlier.

critique: The response inaccurately mentions that Mark stated getting lost three years earlier, however he was missing for a year.

text: This summary is confusing. Mark's wife was not missing. He was.


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The STRIPED WHIPSNAKE (_Masticophis taeniatus_) is a species of nonvenomous snake in the family Colubridae. It is closely related to the California whipsnake (_Masticophis lateralis_). The striped whipsnake is native to the western United States and adjacent northern Mexico.

Identification

The striped whipsnake is approximately 30-72 inches (76–183 cm) in total length (including tail). This snake exhibits black, dark brown, or gray coloration on its back, often with an olive or bluish tint. Along the center of each of the first four rows of pale dorsal scales, is a dark longitudinal stripe. There is a white to cream-colored stripe down its side that is bisected by either a solid or dashed black line. The coloring on the snake's belly tends to be cream to yellowish, fading to white toward the head, and coral pink toward the tail. This snake also features a lower preocular between the upper labial scales of the mouth. The anal scale is divided.

Geographic range

The striped whipsnake is found throughout the western United States and northern Mexico. The northernmost part of its geographic range is in south central Washington, and continues southward into the Great Basin between the Cascade-Sierran crest and the continental divide. Its range then continues southeast across the continental divide into New Mexico and western and central Texas. The southernmost part of its range lies in Michoacán, Mexico. In the Western United States its range also extends outside of the Great Basin into the Rogue River Valley in southwestern Oregon and northern California. There is a population in Bryce Canyon National Park in Utah.

Habitat

The striped whipsnake is commonly found in a wide variety of habitats including shrub lands, grasslands, sagebrush flats, canyons, piñon-juniper woodlands, and open pine-oak forests. It is attracted to both permanent and seasonal rocky streams, and it frequents both flatlands and mountains.

Behavior

The species _M. taeniatus_ is diurnal, active during the day, and is very alert and fast moving. It seeks shelter in rock outcrops, small mammal burrows, as well as in trees and shrubs depending on the habitat they occupy. This snake is nonvenomous, but it preys on a wide variety of species including lizards, other snakes (including venomous rattlesnakes), small mammals, young birds, frogs, and insects.

Reproduction

Little is known about the reproductive activities of _M. taeniatus_. After fertilization the female striped whipsnake will lay a clutch of 3-12 eggs, between the months of June and July, usually in an abandoned rodent burrow. One study has shown a natural incubation period of 44 to 58 days.

Subspecies

There are two subspecies of _Masticophis taeniatus_ which are recognized as being valid, including the nominotypical subspecies.[1]

-   _Masticophis taeniatus girardi_ [2]
-   _Masticophis taeniatus taeniatus_

_Nota bene_: A trinomial authority in parentheses indicates that the subspecies was originally described in a genus other than _Masticophis_.

Etymology

The subspecific name, _girardi_, is in honor of French-American herpetologist Charles Frédéric Girard.[3]

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[3] Beolens, Bo; Watkins, Michael; Grayson, Michael (2011). _The Eponym Dictionary of Reptiles_. Baltimore: Johns Hopkins University Press. xiii + 296 pp. . (_Masticophis taeniatus girardi_, p. 101).

title: Striped whipsnake

question: Is the striped whipsnake dangerous to human beings?

answer: The striped whipsnake is not dangerous to humans. It is a nonvenomous snake.

critique: It is omitted that it preys on a wide variety of species including lizards, other snakes (including venomous rattlesnakes), small mammals, young birds, frogs, and insects.


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It was a bright night, a full moon was in the sky. Two friends of mine and I were staying with my dad's friends at this house out in this big flat grassy field. It had a single short wall to divide part of the yard with the gravel drive way that ran along the wall. At the end of the wall was a car port with a car parked under it. For some reason my two friends and I ran out of the house and started running toward the car port on the side of the wall with the drive way. There was a sort of urgancy to get there first, yet there was no reason to be scared. If anyone was watching us they would just assume it was three kids trying to race each other for no reason other than the fact that we were kids.

I wasn't the fastest, and the drive way was a good distance. I can remember seeing the stars shining bright in the sky aswell as the moon that hung just over the side of the car port. As I watch my two friends getting more and more distance in front of me, I saw something on the horizon releash a huge flash. I stopped dead in my tracks and gazed at this phenomenon. I could see my friends do the same thing. A few moments later an ear shattering boom swept across the field and my body was overtaken by an immense force that knocked me off my feet and onto my back. I sat up with my arms and dumbly gazed at this bright mass expanding in the distance. Enormous debris was flying far away in the distance.

My two friends were already running back down the drive way toward the house. As they passed me I could see utter fear in their faces. They didn't bother too look down at me, and kept running at full speed to the house. I knew I had to get up and run too, but my mind and body were so dazed at what just happened that I couldn't move at all. I was just sitting there staring at this ever expanding fiery mass, and all the debris that it conjured.

Back in the direction of the house I could hear a voice calling, I couldn't hear exactly what they were saying. It was enough to snap me out it. I got to my feet and took one last look at the explosion and the debris that was still hurdeling through the air. Running as fast as I could I made it to the house, I saw everyone sitting around and my two friends were already telling the adults what happened. I was still in shock and probably looked just as clueless as the fathers.
Some time passes, more people gather in the living room; mothers, daughters, a baby. I am sitting by myself. All I can hear are some murmors from the fathers trying to figure things out. I look around to see everyone else with someone, trying to reassure eachother, and I am alone.

We all decide to go outside. There is no more debris in the air, and all you can make of the explosion is a cloudy mass. The moon is still bright and visible, as are the stars. after sometime of hushed conversation that I can't make out, something happens. I look to the moon and lines of light start shining through what appear to be cracks in its surface. The light grows brighter, and as before an unimaginable sound cracks the silence of the night. My heart races and my body is unmovable. Shock overtakes me as a large chunk of the moon flies toward the Earth. It travels slightly beneath the horizon and then makes impact. Another quaking noise goes through the air, but this time at a deeper volume. A tidal wave of lava, smoke and fire rises and billows, covering the night sky. It is moving in every direction at an insane speed.

As everyone is in panic, running and grabbing children, trying to espace their certain doom, I find myself alone, again standing in this grassy field with no one. The most terrifying of all things engulfs my mind. I am going to die alone, with no one to care for, and no one to care for me. There is nothing I can do about it.

The last thing I can remember as the mass of lava approaches is not the fear running through my body, but the slow, calm breeze of the summer night. I accept my fate, and instead of dying in a state of chaos, I decide to come to peace with it, knowing I cannot change anything. I turn around, facing the other direction of the impact. Stars are still visible in the other half of the night sky. It is cloudless and bright. I lay down on the cool grass and gaze upon the universe. There is nothing specifically going through my mind, I am not worried about anything, but I am also not happy at the same time. I am just living in the moment.

As I feel the rumbling behind me, I knew it was getting closer. I take one last look at the night sky, and close my eyes, only hearing the world now. The rumbling grows louder, and my heart races. All of a sudden I hear a tone, my heart is beating slowly. I feel nothing and see darkness.

I wake up.

title: Short Story (can't think of a title)

question: Summarize the main conflict.

answer: The characters are in a field when they are hit by a blast of some kind. The narrator is knocked over and can't see what's happening. He sees his friends running back to the house, and he runs there, too. Everyone is gathered in the living room, trying to figure things out. The moon starts to break apart, and the narrator watches it fall to the Earth. He is afraid because he will die alone. He accepts his fate and lays down to watch the universe. The moon hits the ground and the narrator dies.

critique: The moon doesn't hit the ground. It hits the Earth.

critique: "He is afraid because he will die alone. He accepts his fate and lays down to watch the universe. The moon hits the ground and the narrator dies." - this happened in the dream, not the main conflict.

critique: He isn't hit by a blast. Rather, the narrator sees a meteor slam into the moon and then sees it strike the ground.

critique: The narrator doesn't see the moon breaking apart.

critique: The narrator isn't the only one who sees the moon break apart.

question: Summarize what happens to the moon.

answer: The moon is bright and visible, but the narrator notices cracks in the moon's surface, with light shining through. A large chunk of the moon then flies toward the Earth and makes impact. A tidal wave of lava, smoke, and fire rises and billows, and the narrator feels their heart racing. A chunk of the moon flies toward the Earth, and the narrator feels nothing and sees darkness.

critique: The large chunk of the moon that the narrator can see is not an actual chunk. Rather, a chunk falls from the moon after it was hit and breaks up into smaller pieces that fly toward the Earth. This isn't quite accurate in the answer and should be changed.

question: What does the story say about accepting your fate?

answer: The narrator, who was witnessed an explosion from a fire from a challenger, is then met with a lunar eclipse. Everyone is panicking, running, and grabbing children but the narrator, who is alone, feels that he has accepted his fate, realizing he cannot change anything. The narrator sees the lava and knows he will die alone and decides to come to peace with it, knowing that he cannot change anything. He turns around and hears the rumbling getting closer as he lays down on the cool grass and gaze upon the universe.

critique: The story does not mention a lunar eclipse.

critique: The response contains inaccurate information.

critique: The narrator wasn't witnessing the explosion, he was a part of it.

critique: The narrator is not witnessed an explosion from a fire from a challenger.

critique: The narrator does not witness an explosion from a fire from a challenger.

question: What does the story say about what people do when they are afraid?

answer: No answer

critique: The model should not copy, the instruction in bold is "should give an answer."

question: Summarize the narrator's reaction to their dream.

answer: The narrator wakes up from their dream and feels nothing and sees darkness.

critique: The narrator wakes up from their dream and feels nothing and sees darkness.

critique: The response is missing the narrator's reaction to the dream.

critique: This is a bit vague, and it's not clear that the narrator feels nothing.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator feels nothing because they are dead.

critique: The narrator does not wake up from the dream, they are woken up by the rumbling of the impact.

critique:
The narrator feels nothing and sees darkness after they wake because they are dead.

Preempt the question by mentioning the reality of their death.

critique: The narrator has a panic attack when they realize they are going to die alone.

critique: The narrator wakes up and feels nothing and sees darkness.

text: The story states that the narrator wakes up. That's the end of it.