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A short story I wrote for my English class, hope you like it.

Adnan awoke to a chilling gust of wind flooding the room - snagged by the wind tower. In the corner was his father Rashid, slumped on the chair, his leather eyelids closed. Adnan opened the storage pot to find a meagre amount of dates left, and his stomach growled in protest. Rashid had woken up now, and was uttering gibberish. Adnan decided on leaving the dates for his father - he'd be getting a meal later in the day anyway.

Handing him the bowl, Adnan looked into the old man's milky eyes, which had been blinded by the corrosive, saline water of the Gulf. He wondered what it must be like for your senses to disintegrate, for the world to go black.

As he boarded the sturdy dhow, the sun had risen and the winds had settled, and he could almost feel the seering planks of palm wood through his sandles.

"Adnan, collect the stones from the beach!" barked Khalid, the captain. The stones were hefty rocks that were tied to a diver to allow him to sink faster, and collecting them was an arduous task for a slender person like Adnan.

After hoisting them aboard, the rest of the crew had finished preparations, and the boat was set to sail. The sons of the village rushed to the beach and shoved the boat (which of course was futile, but provided them with a sense of achievement), and with a simultaneous heave of the cumbersome oars, they lurched forward and departed, with Khalid staring sternly into the distance, positioned at the keel.

As the boat hesitantly shifted along the glimmering waters, the divers chanted in unison, helping distract them from the worsening fatigue of the relentless rowing. Adnan did not know the lyrics - they predated even his father - but he murmured away regardless. It was four to every oar, and Adnan was nestled between two stocky men who reeked of rancid body odour. He thought he might faint.

"Are you diving today?" he asked one of them, hoping conversation would take his mind off the noxious smells. The man scoffed, and replied

"Haven't gone under in many-a-year, my son."

Khalid ceased the rowing, and deployed the anchor. At this point, the village was barely in sight. Adnan was given his noseclip to clamp onto his nostrils whilst one of the collossi tied a stone to his ankle. Perched on the edge of the boat, he peered downward into the ominous ocean, and it was just as murky and menacing as he remembered: like a mouth opened wide, ready to swallow him whole. He was startled as a large hand clasped his shoulder.
"Don't you dare surface until you've collected twenty," whispered Khalid, and with that he shoved the boy violently overboard.

The stone yanked Adnan into the abyss, as he flailed about helplessly in its grip. Thud. He opened his eyes ever so slightly, and could just discern the boat far above him, the seabed, the fish, and a cluster of coral ahead. Untying the stone, he waded towards the school which circled the coral, and as they dispersed they revealed a cluster of oysters. He scrambled to scoop them into his basket as his lungs began to ache with a longing for air. Springing off the coral, he kicked viciously - journeying back to the dhow above him.

His lungs pressed against his ribs, as his heart pounded - begging to breathe. The gleaming sunlight coaxed him upwards, teasing his weary body which grew weaker by the second. Surfacing, he swallowed a huge intake of the salty air, and panted greedily, inhaling all that he could. Two muscular palms grasped his wrists and plucked him from the water. The man he had talked to previously snatched his basket, and as Khalid examined the harvest, his brow stiffened.

"This is eighteen."

"Some - some must have fallen out! I was running out of breath!" pleaded Adnan, frightened about the possibility of punishment.

"You can get to work opening what you brought up. When you finish that, you can dive again, alone this time. Oh - and you can forget about lunch."

Adnan was distraught. How would he feed himself? He was penniless, his house a relic of his family's past affluence. He had an old man to attend to, a stomach to appease. He trudged over to his basket on the floor, and equipped himself with a blade, and set to work opening the oysters. He prised open the first one, and discarded the empty oyster into the food pile - they'd be eaten later. The second one was similarly worthless, and the prospects seemed bleak.

On the ninth pearl, Adnan slotted the knife into the small gap of the oyster, and exerted as much force as he could to open it. In an instant, the blade slipped, and sliced his hand. Adnan winced, which attracted the attention of Khalid, who glanced at him suspiciously, before returning to his rope tying. Adnan scattered to collect the pearl that he had dropped onto the floor, and inside, resting in the slithery meat, like some holy offering from a  pilgrim, like a sacred gift from the heavens, lay a swollen, milky sphere, as large as a marble. It was gorgeous, the most perfect thing he had ever laid eyes upon.

He looked up. There were two others near him, all too preoccupied opening oysters to have noticed. Khalid was still working on the ropes it seemed. This could change his life. He could pocket the pearl and flog it for enough money to provide for him and his father for a year, maybe more. He extracted the pearl from its sanctuary and slipped it in his pocket. He knew of the consequences. He would lose his hand. He would be ostracised. Maybe even killed. Before he could rethink his decision, Khalid was looming over him.

"Found any pearls?" he enquired accusingly.

"N-not so far," replied Adnan. Suddenly, Khalid's hand grabbed his ear lobe, and tore him over to the side of the dhow.

"Then you can go down again and find me twenty more," he commanded. The stocky man who he had befriended was tying his stone on, and caught Adnan's eye with a sorrowful look.

Adnan plunged himself into the dark water, and he gently drifted to the bottom, like a piece of cloth. His stone landed, and it threw up a cloud of sand which slithered up his legs, before perishing and falling to the floor. He reached down to untie the string, but the knot wasn't like before, it was complicated and had stubby ends that he couldn't pinch. Panicking, he blew bubbles frantically, and as he despairingly traced their erratic trail with his eyes, the delicate beams of the Arabian sun which pierced the water were eclipsed by the silhouette of a migratory boat.

title: [MF] The Pearl

question: What does the story say about Adnan and Rashid?

answer: Adnan opens the storage pot and is dismayed to find that there are a few dates left. His father, Rashid, is slumped on a chair in the corner. Adnan gives the dates to his father.

critique: The answer omits Adnan's diving mission.

critique: The answer should mention that Rashid is blind.

critique: The answer fails to mention the stones, the diving, or Rashid's blindness for salt water. It also does not mention how Adnan has to leave his father to work.

question: What does the story say about Khalid?

answer: Khalid is the captain of the ship. He orders Adnan to collect stones from the beach and then throws him overboard to collect 20 oysters. He threatens to throw him overboard again if he doesn't find 20 more oysters the second time. Adnan dies because he doesn't have enough breath and his diving stone is tied to him.

critique: Much of this answer is either irrelevant or inaccurate. It should be rewritten.

critique: The answer should mention that Adnan dies because his diving stone is tied to him.

critique: The answer should mention that Adnan dies because he can't untie his diving stone.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The story does not mention that Adnan dies because he doesn't have enough breath and his diving stone is tied to him.

question: What is the story's setting?

answer: The story takes place on a dhow, a traditional Arab sailing vessel, in the Gulf.

critique: The story takes place on a dhow, a traditional Arab sailing vessel, in the Gulf, and underwater.

critique: The story is set in a village in the Gulf.

critique: The story takes place on a dhow, a traditional Arab sailing vessel, in the Gulf. The story also takes place underwater.

critique: The story takes place on a dhow, a traditional Arab sailing vessel, in the Gulf.

critique: The answer should include the time of day.

critique: The story also takes place on the beach and underwater.


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[hospitality technology]

In this age of instant information, technology has become a necessity for the hospitality industry. Guests want instant information with regard to room availability, rates, reviews, hotel facilities etc literally at their fingertips, a.k.a their SmartPhones. To keep up with their guests requirements, hotels need to ensure that they substantially increase their hotel tech spending.

According to HT 2016’s Lodging technology study; hotels across the globe plan to spend 54% more on technology this year with the main priorities being payment and data security, improving technology in the rooms, bandwidth and mobile engagement.

The best news is that this investment is actually beneficial to the hotels in the long haul. The technological trends shall enable to the hotels to make great improvements as well as savings for their property.

TOP TECHNOLOGICAL TRENDS:

INCREASED FOCUS ON PAYMENT AND DATA SECURITY
With cyber crime increasing and evolving at an alarming rate, hotels are ensuring that they invest heavily in payment and data security. As compared to 2015, hotels intend to increase their budget in this particular aspect by 25%. Hotels want to assure their guests that they have secure payment gateways for any online and mobile transactions as well as sophisticated online security to safeguard personal information about their guests.

INTRODUCING ‘SMART’ ROOMS AND FACILITIES
Flat screen TVs, wireless chargers, docking stations, automated lighting and temperature control… these are the demands of the millennial traveller. They want the rooms as well as the conference facilities of the hotel to be technologically savvy. This is why according to 2016 Lodging Technology Study, 22% hotels’ are allocating capital to Room Control Devices and 16% to Smart TVs.

The Pottinger Hotel in Hong Kong goes the extra mile and provides a Smartphone in all their rooms with free mobile data and IDD calls to selected countries. Guests can use the phone to navigate across the city during their stay at the hotel, and the phone also has details about certain promotions for their guests as well as local details about the city.

UPGRADING BANDWIDTH
According to HTNG’s Blake, the biggest priority for a guest is that the hotel’s WiFi should work efficiently and be free. The bandwidth needs to support; the multiple tech devices of the guest in the room as well as across the property, ‘Smart’ room facilities, tech savvy conference gadgets, hotel’s management system and so on.

Globally, hotels are improving their property’s bandwidth so that their guests can use the internet whether for business or pleasure without any hiccups.

MOBILE INTEGRATION
As mentioned in our previous blog – How mobile devices are influencing the future of hospitality, mobile devices and smart phones are part of the complete hotel experience, right from making reservations to checking out.
At Starwood, Hilton and Marriot hotels, guests can use their Smartphone’s as mobile keys to open their hotel room doors and to access guest-only areas. At Virgin Hotel in Chicago, guests can use them to control room temperatures and lighting, and as the TV remote control.

Latest trends include mobile kiosks for check in and check outs, as well as offering concierge in the pocket, where guests can access local information via the hotels app.

MOBILE ENGAGEMENT
Mobile engagement is extremely underutilised and has great potential for hotels to increase their revenues. Hotels can use data from their guest’s Smartphones to offer special offers to them as well as upsell the various points of sales at the hotel.

Mobile engagement enables hotels to provide a personalised experience for their guests by being updated of their preferences and creating special packages as per their taste.

Starwood hotels are using Bluetooth enabled beacons to create personalised experiences, they place beacons near the entrance of their properties, so that as soon as guests enter the hotel, the concierge can greet them by their names.

Technology is forever changing and it may not always be possible for hotels to stay ahead but they should attempt to walk hand in hand with the latest trends. Integrating some of the above trends shall enable hotels to be easily accessible online, upsell their various points of sales, offer personalised service thus resulting in guest loyalty, reduce their carbon footprint by having more e-options rather than printed collateral, and much more, all resulting in better profitability for their property. It’s a complete win-win situation.

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question: Summarize the focus on payment and data security.

answer: With cybercrime increasing and evolving at an alarming rate, hotels are ensuring they invest heavily in payment and data security. As compared to 2015, hotels intend to increase their budget in this particular aspect by 25%. Hotels want to assure their guests that they have secure payment gateways for any online and mobile transactions as well as sophisticated online security to safeguard personal information about their guests.

critique: The 25% increase is not important to the question.

critique: The article does not specify the percentage increase in budget for payment and data security.

question: Summarize smart rooms in hotels.

answer: Smart rooms are rooms with modern technology, such as flat screen TVs, wireless chargers, docking stations, automated lighting and temperature control. These are the demands of millennial travellers. Hotels are allocating capital to Room Control Devices and Smart TVs.

critique: It is omitted that the Pottinger Hotel in Hong Kong goes the extra mile and provides a Smartphone in all their rooms with free mobile data and IDD calls to selected countries. Guests can use the phone to navigate across the city during their stay at the hotel, and the phone also has details about certain promotions for their guests as well as local details about the city.

critique: The response misses to mention that the Pottinger Hotel in Hong Kong goes the extra mile and provides a Smartphone in all their rooms with free mobile data and IDD calls to selected countries. Guests can use the phone to navigate across the city during their stay at the hotel, and the phone also has details about certain promotions for their guests as well as local details about the city.

critique: The answer should mention the Pottinger Hotel in Hong Kong.

question: Summarize the concerns with bandwidth.

answer: The biggest concern is that the bandwidth needs to support the multiple tech devices of the guest in the room as well as across the property. The bandwidth needs to support the hotel's management system, the smart room facilities, and the tech savvy conference gadgets. The hotel's WiFi should work efficiently and be free.

critique: The hotel's WiFi should work efficiently and be free is not a concern.

question: How are mobile devices influencing the future of hospitality?

answer: Mobile devices are part of the complete hotel experience. Guests can use their Smartphones as mobile keys to open their hotel room doors and to access guest-only areas. At Virgin Hotel in Chicago, guests can use them to control room temperatures and lighting, and as the TV remote control. Latest trends include mobile kiosks for check in and check outs, as well as offering concierge in the pocket, where guests can access local information via the hotels app.

critique: The answer could be more specific about the various ways in which mobile devices are influencing the future of hospitality.

critique: The answer should mention the mobile engagement.

critique: The answer can mention the mobile engagement trend.


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[Roy Roberts performs at _Scripture Cake_ movie premiere] ROY ROBERTS (born February 22, 1943) is an American blues musician, record producer, and singer-songwriter. Roberts grew up in a small town in Livingston, Tennessee, United States, listening to blues and R&B on radio stations. At the age of 14 he worked on a nearby farm to earn the money for his first guitar, a mail order Sears Silvertone.

History

Roberts left farm-life at age 18 to live with an uncle in Greensboro, North Carolina. He was inspired to become a professional musician after he went to a nightclub where Jerry Butler was performing. Roberts worked hard honing his guitar skills while playing in bands until he landed a job with local Greensboro hero, Guitar Kimbers’ Untouchables. Before long, he began backing up major artists who came through town.

One major artist, Solomon Burke, took Roberts under his wing after letting him sit in as a bass player during a local gig. Roberts soon became the guitarist behind Burke on tour. Roberts subsequently picked up touring gigs with Eddie Floyd, “Little” Stevie Wonder, Dee Clark and Otis Redding, while fronting his own band, The Roy Roberts Experience, on the regional club scene and Southeastern beach town circuit.

Roberts began to cut records in the mid-1960s, staying mostly behind the scenes as a session musician with Eddie Floyd, Dee Clark, Stevie Wonder, William Bell, Solomon Burke, and Otis Redding. The death of Otis Redding inspired Roberts to step up to the microphone with a song dedicated to the late crooner. The record was released on Nina Simone’s NinaAndy label. Roberts followed this successful effort with a string of singles that carried him well into the 1970s. During the disco years, Roberts turned his talents to country music, touring with O.B. McClinton and releasing a number of country records. After a brief hiatus from the music scene, Roberts built a recording studio in Virginia in 1989, where he produced records by regional gospel artists and cut a gospel record of his own.

In the early 1990s, Roberts returned to Greensboro, and built Rock House Records recording studio. Besides recording his own material on Rock House, Roberts has produced albums for Priscilla Price, Lou Pride, Chick Willis, Skeeter Brandon, Floyd Miles and Eddie Floyd. He has won numerous awards for his record production and his own music.

Discography

-   _Introducing Roy Roberts_ - 1994
-   _A Woman Needs Love_ - 1995
-   _Roy Roberts Live_ - 1995
-   _Every Shade of Blue_ - 1997
-   _Deeper Shade of Blue_ - 1999
-   _Burnin’ Love_ - 2001
-   _Daylight with a Flashlight_ - 2003
-   _Partners and Friends_ - 2004
-   _By Request -The Best of Roy Roberts_ - 2005
-   _Sicily Moon_ - 2006
-   _Roy Roberts & Friends_ (Blues & Soul Review) - 2006
-   _Man with a Message_ (Gospel) - 2007
-   _It's Only You_ - 2008
-   _Strange Love_ - 2011[1]

Films

_Scripture Cake_,[2] a movie written, directed, and produced by Dr. Emily D. Edwards, contained six songs by Roberts. Four were original material, two were instrumentals only. He also sings a medley of gospel songs.

Awards

-   2001

    Keeping the Blues Alive - Piedmont Blues Preservation Society[3]

-   2002

    Cover of _The Living Blues_ Magazine[4]
    _The Living Blues_ Producer of the Year[5]
    Artist Most Deserving of Wider Recognition[6]
    Best Blues Album - Chick Willis' _From the Heart & Soul_ was produced by Roy Roberts at his Rock House Records Studio[7]

-   2003

    Franco Rubegni Award (For the spreading of soul music)

-   2004

    CBMA Blues Song of the Year for “I Slipped”[8]

-   2006

    CBMA Pioneer Award and induction into the Hall of Fame[9]
    Interstate highway sign dedicated to Roberts by his hometown of Livingston, Tennessee

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title: Roy Roberts (blues artist)

question: Summarize Roberts' collaborations with other musicians.

answer: Roberts was a session musician for Eddie Floyd, Dee Clark, Stevie Wonder, Solomon Burke, and Otis Redding. He toured with O.B. McClinton and recorded a number of country records. He produced albums for Priscilla Price, Lou Pride, Chick Willis, Skeeter Brandon, Floyd Miles, and Eddie Floyd. He collaborated with Dr. Emily D. Edwards on the movie Scripture Cake, which contained six songs by Roberts.

critique: This should be omitted because it is not relevant to the question.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The answer should mention that he toured with Solomon Burke.

critique: Roberts also collaborated with Jerry Butler.

text: The response should mention Roberts' first collaboration with Guitar Kimbers' Untouchables.

category: coverage

question: Summarize everything relating to Roberts' own recording career.

answer: Roberts began to cut records in the mid-1960s. He released a string of singles that carried him well into the 1970s. He turned to country music in the disco years, releasing a number of country records. He built a recording studio in Virginia in 1989, where he produced records by regional gospel artists and cut a gospel record of his own. He returned to Greensboro in the early 1990s and built Rock House Records recording studio. He has produced albums for Priscilla Price, Lou Pride, Chick Willis, Skeeter Brandon, Floyd Miles, and Eddie Floyd. He has won numerous awards for his record production and his own music.

critique: The answer should mention the release of his own gospel album.

critique: The answer is a summary of everything relating to Roberts' career, not just his own recording career.

critique: The answer should mention that Roberts' own discography includes Introducing Roy Roberts, A Woman Needs Love, Roy Roberts Live, Every Shade of Blue, Deeper Shade of Blue, Burnin' Love, Daylight with a Flashlight, Partners and Friends, By Request, Sicily Moon, Roy Roberts & Friends, Man with a Message, and It's Only You.

critique: Roberts' own recording career ended in the 1970s.

critique: The last two lines of the response are irrelevant to his recording career.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The answer is too long and includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

question: Summarize everything relating to musical genres.

answer: Roberts left farm-life early in his teens to become a musician. He worked with "Guitar Kimbers' Untouchables" before becoming the guitarist for Solomon Burke's tour. He toured with other big names like Eddie Floyd and Little Stevie Wonder, then turned towards disco and country music. His blues-inspired performance at the Ascension GospelChurch led to his success with popular gospel and spiritual music. To bring indie, blues rock, and country vibes to Greensboro and Virginia, he built Rock House Records, where he also worked with singers like Priscilla Price, Lou Pride, Chick Willis, Skeeter Brandon, Floyd Miles, and Eddie Floyd.

critique: The answer is much more about Roberts' career than it is about the different musical genres.

critique: Roberts turned to disco and country music in the 1970s, not in the 1990s.

critique: The answer is a summary of Roberts' career, not a summary of musical genres.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: Roberts' blues-inspired performance at the Ascension Gospel Church is not relevant to the question.

critique: The response is missing the first part of Roberts' career.

critique: The answer should state that the passage does not mention what musical genre Roberts is known for.

text: "then turned towards disco and country music. His blues-inspired performance at the Ascension GospelChurch led to his success with popular gospel and spiritual music. To bring indie" - this is incorrect. Roberts never made disco music, the blues-inspired performance at the Ascension Gospel Church never happened anywhere in the text, and it was never implied that he brought "indie" to Greensboro.

category: accuracy

question: Summarize Roberts' foray into disco music.

answer: Roberts turned his talents to country music during the disco years. He toured with O.B. McClinton and released a number of country records.

critique: It is omitted that Roberts turned his talents to country music during the disco years. He toured with O.B. McClinton and released a number of country records.

critique: The answer should mention that Roberts turned his talents to country music during the disco years.

text: The response should say that Roberts never played or made disco music.


text:
by CYRYL JAKUBOWSKI

All but two Northwest Side legislators supported the bill reforming the state’s pension system, with opponents of Senate Bill 1 saying they thought it was unfair and illegal under the state Constitution to reduce retirees’ benefits.

The measure was approved 30-24 with three legislators voting present in the Illinois Senate and 62-53 with one legislator voting present in the Illinois House of Representatives. Quinn signed the bill on Dec. 5, and it will go in to effect on June 1.

The plan covers the retirement systems of state employees, teachers excluding employees from Chicago, state university employees and the General Assembly.

Workers age 45 and younger will have to work longer to qualify for retirement. For each year an employee is younger than age 46 the retirement age will increase by 4 months. The automatic 3 percent compounded annual increase in retirement income will be replaced by a system based on years of service and tied to inflation.

Current liability will be reduced by about $21.4 billion when the plan takes effect, and long-term liability will be reduced by estimated $160 billion, according to an analysis provided by state Representative Greg Harris (D-13).

Harris said that the bill was passed after years of discussion and many proposals. He said that the underfunded pension system, the increasing outlay of general revenue funds to meet obligations and the ability to pay benefits to current and future retirees were the driving factors behind the bill.

Harris said that provisions in the bill regarding cost-of-living increases, funding guarantees and the funding schedule cannot be separated and would be struck down if any or all are found unconstitutional by the Illinois Supreme Court.

State Representative John D’Amico (D-15) said that he voted for the bill because it will preserve the state’s pensions.

"If we did nothing we would lose them in the long run," D’Amico said. "I’m not a constitution lawyer and I’m not sure what will happen with this if it gets challenged, but I want to preserve pensions.

"This did not happen overnight but through years of mismanagement. Everybody sacrifices, but I’m glad that we preserved the low-income pensions as well. We all understood that this was a tough vote."

State Representative Robert Martwick (D-19) said that he voted against the bill because it removes collective bargaining rights from public employees. Martwick also said that the bill fell short of what was needed to accomplish fair reform.

"In every bill there are challenges, and I wanted to vote yes, but I just could not get myself there because there were several flaws with this bill," Martwick said. He said that employees who have contributed to the pension system for years should have had a seat at the negotiating table.

Martwick said that former governors and legislators who skipped pension payments and borrowed against the system created the pension crisis. He said in a statement that when he ran for office he promised that he would demand that public employees who were without fault would be given the respect that they earned a seat at the negotiating table. "They were not," he said.

Martwick said that details about the bill were not released to the legislators until less than 24 hours before they were scheduled for a vote last week.

"It was sent to me at 2:51 p.m. on Dec. 2, and we are beginning discussion at 8:39 a.m. the following day," Martwick said. "From a philosophical standpoint, there is something wrong when the leaders think that if they debate something enough it won’t pass so lets just ram it through."

"I understand that they have been talking about this forever and some things did not need to be discussed again, but it is still a part of the process," Martwick said. "I am disappointed with the negotiations. I understand that negotiations are tough and it’s hard to reach consensus, but we needed to stick to the process."

"Ultimately I think that this pension reform is taking money away from peoples’ pensions," Martwick said. "We loaded busloads of people to protest (Wisconsin) Governor Scott Walker, and we do this now? I am fundamentally in disagreement with taking away peoples’ pensions."

Martwick also said that the legislation could harm the state’s university system because it will be difficult for the universities to attract and retain top professors and researchers.

The other Northwest Side legislator who voted no was state Senator William Delgado (D-2).

State Senator John Mulroe (D-10) said that his office received a lot of angry feedback from constituents after he voted in favor of the bill.

"It has been pretty tense," Mulroe said. "I’m not a very popular guy at the moment, and it’s not so much the angry sentiment from the teachers but from retirees who will get hurt.

"It was a difficult vote. The pension system was heading in the wrong direction and we could not do nothing."

Mulroe said that he is unsure what will happen when the bill is challenged in the courts. "I don’t think that deep down I would have voted for it if I truly thought it was unconstitutional," he said. "It’s just this grimy process we call democracy that we have to grind through to get to the right solution."

"Its very uncomfortable to talk about this bill because we are taking away funding from people when they were promised something," Mulroe said. "We over-promised as a state, and it’s breaking people’s hearts."

State Senator Heater Steans (D-7) said in a statement that arriving at a yes vote was not easy.

"Action on the pension crisis is necessary now to assure the long-tem health of state pension systems and to alleviate the extreme budgetary pressures that has prevented schools and human services from being adequately funded, endangered the affordability of a college education and necessitated reductions in the state work force, despite the temporary tax increase I supported," Steans said.

"Illinois is moving forward," Quinn said in a statement. "This is a serious solution to address the most dire fiscal challenge of our time . . . Working together, we will continue to build a brighter future for the people of Illinois."

The bills were sponsored by state Senator Kwame Raoul (D-13) and House Speaker Michael Madigan (D-22).

"I was convinced that standing fast for substantial savings, clear intent and an end to unaffordable annual raises would result in a sound plan that will meet all constitutional challenges," Madigan said.

"I applaud the governor for prioritizing this issue," Senate President John Cullerton (D-6) said. "I look forward to working with him and all legislative leaders to ensure that we continue on this path of fiscal leadership and bipartisan cooperation."

Under the law, the state will adopt a funding schedule that requires level payments and achieves 100 percent funding no later than the end of fiscal year 2044. The law includes a funding guarantee that gives the retirement systems the right to go to court if the state fails to make the required payment to its pension fund.

There will be no reductions in pension checks going out to current retirees, and the law is designed to minimize the effect on lower-earning and longer-serving employees.

Current employees will see cost-of-living adjustment pauses every other year after retirement, with the number of pauses determined by their current age. The law also reduces the amount of money current employees pay into their pensions by 1 percent, and there will be increases in retirement age based on the age of the employee, with a maximum increase of 5 years.

question: Who does the new Illinois State pension bill ultimately benefit?

answer: It benefits the current government of Illinois, which is run by Democrats.

question: What is the main disadvantage of the new pensions bill?

answer: Workers who are younger than 45 will have to work longer to qualify for retirement, and for each year an employee is younger than age 46, the retirement age will increase by 4 months.

critique: The answer does not mention the other disadvantage of the bill.

critique: There is no main disadvantage listed in the text.

critique: The answer should mention that the bill reduces the retirement income.

critique: not clear what purpose this response serves

critique: The answer does not mention the reduction in cost-of-living adjustments.

critique: The answer does not mention that the bill will reduce the retirement income.

question: How did the legislators manage to get the required votes despite the bill facing loads of opposition?

answer: It is not stated.

critique: It is omitted that the bill was passed after years of discussion and many proposals.

question: Is it certain that this new bill will be struck down in the courts?

answer: Possibly, because no one knows what the courts will do.

critique: This answer does not seem to be precise enough and the next response can provide the said response.

critique: It is not stated that the bill will be struck down.

critique: The answer should mention that the bill is unconstitutional.

critique: The answer should mention the constitutional challenges.


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Springfield School District}} The SPRINGFIELD TOWNSHIP SCHOOL DISTRICT is a community public school district that serves students in pre-kindergarten through sixth grade from Springfield Township in Burlington County, New Jersey, United States.[1]

As of the 2018–19 school year, the district, comprising one school, had an enrollment of 226 students and 22.7 classroom teachers (on an FTE basis), for a student–teacher ratio of 10.0:1.[2]

The district is classified by the New Jersey Department of Education as being in District Factor Group “FG”, the fourth-highest of eight groupings. District Factor Groups organize districts statewide to allow comparison by common socioeconomic characteristics of the local districts. From lowest socioeconomic status to highest, the categories are A, B, CD, DE, FG, GH, I and J.[3]

Public school students in seventh through twelfth grades attend the schools of the Northern Burlington County Regional School District, which also serves students from Chesterfield Township, Mansfield Township, North Hanover Township, along with children of military personnel based at Joint Base McGuire–Dix–Lakehurst.[4][5] As of the 2018–19 school year, the high school district, comprising two schools, had an enrollment of 2,190 students and 163.4 classroom teachers (on an FTE basis), for a student–teacher ratio of 13.4:1.[6] The schools in the district (with 2018–19 enrollment data from the National Center for Education Statistics[7]) are Northern Burlington County Regional Middle School[8] with 811 students in grades 7 - 8 and Northern Burlington County Regional High School[9] with 1,348 students in grades 9-12.[10] Both schools are in the Columbus section of Mansfield Township. Using a formula that reflects the population and the value of the assessed property in each of the constituent municipalities, taxpayers in Springfield Township pay 17.7% of the district's tax levy, with the district's 2013-14 budget including $35.6 million in spending.[11]

School

-   Springfield Township School had an enrollment of 225 students in grades PreK-6 as of the 2018–19 school year.[12]

Administration

Core members of the district's administration are:[13][14]

-   Craig Vaughn, Superintendent[15]
-   David Gorski, Business Administrator / Board Secretary[16]

Board of education

The district's board of education, with nine members, sets policy and oversees the fiscal and educational operation of the district through its administration. As a Type II school district, the board's trustees are elected directly by voters to serve three-year terms of office on a staggered basis, with three seats up for election each year held (since 2012) as part of the November general election. The board appoints a superintendent to oversee the day-to-day operation of the district.[17][18][19]

[1] Springfield Township Board of Education District Policy 0110 - Identification, Springfield Township School District. Accessed February 14, 2020. “Purpose: The Board of Education exists for the purpose of providing a thorough and efficient system of free public education in grades Kindergarten through six in the Springfield Township School District. Composition The Springfield Township School District is all the area within the municipal boundaries of Springfield Township.”

[2] District information for Springfield Township School District, National Center for Education Statistics. Accessed April 1, 2020.

[3] NJ Department of Education District Factor Groups (DFG) for School Districts, New Jersey Department of Education. Accessed December 8, 2014.

[4] Northern Burlington County Regional High School 2016-17 Report Card Narrative, New Jersey Department of Education. Accessed March 22, 2018. “Northern Burlington County Regional High School proudly serves students from Chesterfield, Mansfield, North Hanover, and Springfield Townships, as well as students from Joint Base McGuire-Dix Lakehurst.”

[5] Esposito, Martha. “Discover Burlington County 2013: Regional School Districts”, _Burlington County Times_, April 26, 2015. Accessed May 31, 2016. “Northern Burlington County Regional - Serves: Chesterfield, Mansfield, North Hanover, Springfield, Joint Base McGuire-Dix-Lakehurst”

[6] District information for Northern Burlington County Regional School District, National Center for Education Statistics. Accessed April 1, 2020.

[7] School Data for the Northern Burlington County Regional School District, National Center for Education Statistics. Accessed April 1, 2020.

[8] Northern Burlington County Regional Middle School, Northern Burlington County Regional School District. Accessed February 13, 2020.

[9] Northern Burlington County Regional High School, Northern Burlington County Regional School District. Accessed February 13, 2020.

[10] New Jersey School Directory for the Northern Burlington County Regional School District, New Jersey Department of Education. Accessed December 29, 2016.

[11] Zimmaro, Mark. “Sharp tax increase included in Northern Burlington budget”, _Burlington County Times_, April 8, 2013. Accessed December 1, 2013. “The $35.6 million budget represents a 2.7 percent increase from last year’s spending plan.... Tax rates in sending districts are determined using a state equalization formula that takes into account factors such as population and assessed values. Based on the formula, Chesterfield taxpayers fund 21.6 percent of Northern Burlington’s tax levy, Mansfield 46.5 percent, North Hanover 14.2 percent and Springfield 17.7 percent.”

[12] School Data for Springfield Township School District, National Center for Education Statistics. Accessed April 1, 2020.

[13] Staff Directory, Springfield Township School District. Accessed February 13, 2020.

[14] New Jersey School Directory for Burlington County, New Jersey Department of Education. Accessed December 29, 2016.

[15] About the Superintendent, Springfield Township School District. Accessed February 13, 2020.

[16] Business Office, Springfield Township School District. Accessed February 13, 2020.

[17] New Jersey Boards of Education by District Election Types - 2018 School Election, New Jersey Department of Education, updated February 16, 2018. Accessed January 26, 2020.

[18] _Comprehensive Annual Financial Report of the Springfield Township School District_, New Jersey Department of Education, for year ending June 30, 2019. Accessed August 18, 2020. "The Springfield Township School District is a Type II School District located in the County of Burlington, State of New Jersey. As a Type II School District, the School District functions independently through a Board of Education. The Board is nine members elected to three-year terms. These terms are staggered so that three members’ terms expire each year. The District provides a full range of educational services appropriate to grade levels K through 6. "

[19] Board of Education Members. Springfield Township School District. Accessed February 13, 2020.

title: Springfield Township School District (New Jersey)

question: What does the text say about the district's enrollment?

answer: As of the 2018-19 school year, the district had an enrollment of 226 students and 22.7 classroom teachers. The district had an enrollment of 225 students in grades pre-kindergarten through sixth grade.

critique: The district's enrollment is 226 students, not 225.

critique: The second sentence is not relevant to the question.


text:
    During life people are called many things, some good, some bad. Within a short eight years I’ve been called; a student, worker, son, good listener, hero, savior, and many more. Since I was ten I’ve been talking people out of suicide online. During my eight years of helping people, I’ve helped many people, created an online organization, and learned many new things. This has forever and will constantly change my life.

    Many people ask me, how did this happen? How does a ten year old get mixed up with people’s lives? It was three days after my tenth birthday, the smell of my moms homemade cake was still tangible in the air. I logged onto the computer and found a chat room. I came across a man inside the room. He was talking about ending his life because his wife was cheating on him and getting his kids. My heart was in my ears beating hard, my palms were clammy and wet like a river. I talked with him till late in the night past any ten year olds bed time. This man was set and ready to die, a mere child stopped him. Me.

    A few months after helping the man, I met a girl my age who was rather interested in the “work” I did. She wanted to be part of the action. Lillie and I decided to work together helping people we would find in chat rooms. This continued for about a year. Lillie started to struggle with herself, the constant pressure of someone’s life in your hands at that young of an age takes a heavy toll upon the beholder. Lillie messaged me one night, “Dominic I have a problem” I asked her what it was and she stated, she wanted to die. She couldn’t take helping people anymore. I remember crying, panicking, wanting her to see it my way and not do what she was planning. It all ended so fast only three words remained “Lillie Signed Off.”

    Three years have passed since Lillie’s death, I created an online organization, filled with teens helping people out of dark thoughts. I created this organization in memory of Lillie. DarkShadows. DarkShadows, was constructed of teens from around the world, looking for people with suicidal thoughts that wanted to help prevent suicide. One hundred and ninety-seven teens joined DarkShadows. Each night we would have meetings and we would talk with one another to see if everyone was ok. I learned that this “job” is to hard for one child to take on alone day in and day out, there needs to be an escape route. DarkShadows showed some amazing results, the teens in DarkShadows were able to talk to five hundred plus people out of suicide. With every construction there is a destruction.

    I had a hard time destroying DarkShadows for I was proud of it. I closed down DarkShadows because the stress was enormous, two people were talking people into suicide, three people committed suicide from the pressure, and people started to not care. DarkShadows lasted three years and I was shocked that I could uphold it for so long, but I knew it had to go. I will never forget what I’ve learned from these past experiences.

    I’ve learned, many things over the past few years. I’ve learned that even though the world seems to burn like a raging fireball, there are many people out there still that care for others. I’ve learned that it doesn’t take a hero to save someone, you don’t need a utility belt, powers, cape, gadgets, or a “cool” name to save someone. All you need is a heart, and the will power, and the determination. Everyone is a hero in a way, you’re a hero to your kid, give someone some change for the bus, do something that is not expected from you. You are a hero.

    My life has changed drastically due to this “job”. I have become a better listener, I became mature, I met new people. I think back from when I was ten, I would have never imagined that helping that one guy would take me this far. I feel that due to this, I have a good understanding of people. I can “read” them easier. At times I have thought is it worth it? Is it worth spending hours upon hours helping someone that I don’t even know? When you help someone the end result of them being alive thanks to you is by far the best feeling you can think of. My life will never be the same due to this and for that I am grateful.

    During my short life span I’ve been a lot of things and experienced even more things. Do these names and experiences define me? Or simply give a better understanding of me? By helping one man live through the loss of his wife and kids. I met a great friend that I hold dear in my heart. I became a leader, making tough decisions for a lot of people. I learned, people still care for one another in this world. This has ultimately affected, and effected my life forever and I will never forget it. To be a Hero, you don’t need a cape or a utility belt, just a heart.

title: To Be A Hero You Need A Heart (True Story)

question: What would have happened if Lillie did not kill herself?

answer: Dominic owns and runs DarkShadows, a global organization that tries to help people in need as well as prevent suicide. If Lillie did not kill herself and was still part of his life, Dominic would have never created DarkShadows.

critique: The answer is a bit speculative. It is possible that Dominic would have started the group even if Lillie did not kill herself.

critique: "Dominic owns and runs DarkShadows, a global organization that tries to help people in need as well as prevent suicide. If Lillie did not kill herself and was still part of his life, Dominic would have never created DarkShadows." - this is incorrect. Dominic created DarkShadows because he was inspired by Lillie's death.

critique: Dominic created DarkShadows in memory of Lillie.


text:
The Celebration

Sarah slipped out onto the balcony of her loft.  From the twelfth floor, Chicago was a Lite-Brite cityscape, each building and monument pegged into the grid.  Metered and regular, from what appeared in the streets as a tangle of twisted metal and cement, a careful design emerged.  Sarah enjoyed this view of Chicago.  It didn't make her nervous.  From ground level, the chaos overwhelmed her.  Perhaps she just thought about it too much.

Leaving the building, into the street, Sarah set out down East 21st, headed toward Michigan Avenue.  Her bag held a bottle of wine, a corkscrew, a tube of lipstick, and five crumpled ones.  A napkin from Armadillo Red, tucked into her back right pocket, gave directions to park bench six blocks from her building.

On a bench in Grant Park, a man sat waiting.  He filled out the crossword puzzle from a three-day-old newspaper.  He had been troubled for the last two hours by number 27 across.  A kitchen gadget, 7 letters.  Blender didn't fit, microwave was too long, and he didn't have enough interest in culinary arts to know of any others.  Frustrated, he pulled out his watch, noting that the person he was waiting for had three minutes to arrive.

Sarah, realizing the time, began to walk more briskly.  She turned down Hendricks and kept toward the curb, avoiding those staking out various doorways and dark inlets.  She kept her eyes on the sidewalk, except to occasionally glance ahead at those approaching.  A man, older, dressed for an evening out, turned the corner half a block ahead.  Sarah, startled, pulled the corkscrew from her bag.  She glanced up more frequently as they approached.  Twenty paces. Now fifteen. Now ten.  She gripped the makeshift weapon tightly in her left hand.  As they passed each other on the sidewalk, she shifted her body toward the man.  Swinging forward, she pushed and twisted in one fluid motion, sinking the metal deeply into his chest. Sarah stepped back and watched him crumple.  The man lifted his head.  He saw Sarah, but his expression did not change.  He pulled the stainless steel from between his ribs, and the blood began to rush from his body.  Sarah waited until his eyes were empty, then snapped away from the scene.  She was going to be late.  Picking up the corkscrew, she stepped around the body and down the sidewalk.

As she approached the man on the bench, he suddenly realized that "toaster" was the word he required.  Scribbling it in and wedging the paper between the bench slats, he silently congratulated himself, then focused on the matter at hand.  Sarah was seething.  "Why? Why like that? Why didn't you tell me, bastard!"  He replied, "I thought it would be interesting.  Besides, it's like ripping off a band-aid.  Sometimes it's better when you have to do it quick.  Either way, I see that it's been done."  Sarah was silent for a moment, and then extended her hand.  "Give me the envelope".

He handed her a manila folder.  Sarah sat down on the grass beside the bench, and spread the contents under a streetlight's glow.  Photographs of the man she had just buried her corkscrew in fanned out like a silent film.  He was shown leaving various cafes, trailed by a different escort each time.  There were snapshots of the man entering Porsches and exiting hired cars.   A copy of his passport listed his name as "Victor Bartoshevich", a Belarusian national.  A birth certificate, for one Sarah Yurevich, bore his signature.  A copy of a wire transfer, made twenty-seven years ago, indicated that $50,000 had been drawn from he and his first late wife's joint checking. The recipient was a hitman who helped facilitate "alternatives to divorce" for those in positions of power and influence.  Victor Bartoshevich, a notoriously private man, would have been shocked to see his own paper trail.

Victor left the cafe on Hendricks at precisely 2:30am, as had become his routine over the past few months.  Rochelle always worked on Tuesdays, and she had better tits than money could ever buy.  Victor paid for them by the hour.  After a night of indulgence, Victor would stumble the block back home.  Aging and "out of the business", he had reconciled with the most hostile of his enemies long ago, and had been enjoying retirement his own way.   Namely, walking alone through the streets of Chicago after dark, and ignoring his estranged daughter's attempts at contact.

Sarah placed the envelope into her purse, and pulled out the bottle of Merlot.  Wiping the corkscrew on the newspaper, she then maneuvered it into the cork, using the same push-twist familiar from thirty minutes prior.  Taking a swig from the bottle, she passed it up to the man on the bench.  They drank the wine and finished the crossword together.  Through the trees they could see the flashing blue lights like fireworks, and imagine the sirens as their parade.

title: Flash Fiction: The Celebration

question: What does the story say about the relationship between Sarah and the man on the bench?

answer: There is no relationship between Sarah and the man on the bench.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The man on the bench is the one who gave Sarah the information about her father.

critique: It is omitted that they are partners in crime.

critique: The man hands over the evidence on which Sarah used to kill her father. It is implied the relationship is predator and prey, which is not an unfriendly tone.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The story says that Sarah and the man on the bench are accomplices.

critique: It is omitted that the man on the bench is a hitman.

critique: There is a relationship between Sarah and the man on the bench. They share a bottle of wine and do the crossword together.

critique: The answer is false. The man on the bench is the one who hired the hitman to kill her father.

question: What does the story say is the relationship between Victor Bartoshevich and Sarah?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that Sarah is his daughter.

critique: a friendship between Sarah and Victor: Sarah finds out her father was a retired private eye, who was killed by a paid hit man.

question: What does the story say about why Victor Bartoshevich was Sarah's target?

answer: After not reaching out to any of her divorce counselors, Sarah focused her attention on her own father. Unbeknownst to Sarah, her father had been in contact with a hitman, who probably spearheaded her divorce. However, Sarah caught him in fancy cars going to see another prostitute while pulling out money he would have been using to pay his daughter, who he apparently abandoned from birth, from her divorce court settlement. Because of this extensive treachery, Sarah can no longer trust anyone, including her own father.

critique: Elements of the response are either confusing following some elements of the passage.

critique: The response is not related to the question.

critique: It is not stated that Sarah focused her attention on her own father.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The response contains inaccurate information.

text: Sarah is never mentioned to have divorce counselors. That part of the answer is made up.

refinement: After not reaching out to any of her divorce counselors, Sarah focused her attention on her own father. Unbeknownst to Sarah, her father had been in contact with a hitman, who probably spearheaded her divorce. However, Sarah caught him in fancy cars going to see another prostitute while pulling out money he would have been using to pay his daughter, who he apparently abandoned from birth, from her divorce court settlement. Because of this extensive treachery, Sarah can no longer trust anyone, including her own father.


text:
[]I was elated to see Sunday night that the musical movie, _La La Land_, did so well at the Golden Globes. We needed a movie that screamed hope and optimism. As Emma Stone said in her Golden Globes acceptance speech, “This is a film for dreamers. And I think that hope and creativity are two of the most important things in the world, and that’s what this movie is about. So, to any creative person who’s had a door slammed in their face, either metaphorically or physically … or anybody anywhere, really, who feels like giving up sometimes, but finds it in themselves to get up and keep moving forward, I share this with you.” We – in the social sector – are the ultimate dreamers. One of my favorite social entrepreneurs, Elisa Birnbaum, did an amazing piece on this very topic in her online publication, SEE Change Magazine, that warmed my soul, and I begged her to share it with us here at the Social TrendSpotter. I hope you walk away refreshed and ready to dream big in 2017.

_In the recently released movie,_ La La Land_, two aspiring artists navigate the demands, expectations and sobriety of the “real world.” Mia (Emma Stone) is an actress with consistently disappointing auditions who moonlights as a coffee shop barista, while Sebastian (Ryan Gosling) is an old-school jazz musician, a purist with dreams of opening his own jazz club, who’d rather lose money than play simplistic holiday jingles at a restaurant._

_The movie’s other prominent character is Los Angeles. In some scenes, it’s portrayed as a bright and cheery place where dreams really do come true. In others, with its mask unfurled, LA is painted with gloomier brushstrokes of rejection and disappointment. At various points in the film, both characters reconsider their “foolishness” and contemplate trading in their dreams for more grown-up (read: realistic) pursuits. Lucky for us – and them – they come back to their (non)senses._

_In one pivotal scene, Mia is asked to relate a personal story during an audition. She proceeds to sing (this is a musical, after all) about a beloved aunt, a fellow dreamer, fool – and apparent role model who lived life to the fullest, skeptics be damned. The song is a powerful homage to the fool in our midst: “Here’s to the ones who dream, Foolish as they may seem, Here’s to the hearts that ache, Here’s to the mess we make. … So bring on the rebels, The ripples from pebbles, The painters and poets and plays …”_

_“LA LA LAND STANDS AS AN ODE TO THE DREAMER, A TRIBUTE TO THE FOLKS WHO TAKE RISKS, WHO STAND TALL AND STRONG IN FACE OF NAYSAYERS AND DISBELIEVERS – OFTEN THEMSELVES INCLUDED.”_

_In many ways, it’s the story of writer-director Damien Chazelle, who was repeatedly denied the chance to make the movie. But this dreamer didn’t give up, pulling off the passion project after six years, a testament to the power of foolish pursuits. As he stated in an interview, “I wanted the movie to be a love letter to not just dreams, but to the kinds of dreams that society often mocks.”_

_And that’s the point. The world needs dreamers just like it needs realists whose feet never soar beyond the puddles on the pavement. Dreamers yearn for a better world, a better life. They infuse our possibilities with color, awe and wonderment. Dreamers believe in something bigger than ourselves, even when it’s deemed impractical, unrealistic. They question the status quo and convention, regularly defying them and their assumptions, and always ask for more – of themselves and of others._

_Dreamers give us pause, inspire contemplation, push boundaries and force us beyond comfort zones, begging us to see beauty in the ordinary. Dreamers gave us Harry Potter, Facebook and Apple. But dreamers were also suffragettes, civil and human rights activists, environmentalists and peacemakers. Like Mia, Sebastian and Chazelle, they believe that life is not fully realized without those dreams._

_I spend a lot of my time writing about dreamers – social entrepreneurs, changemakers, who are often dismissed, rejected outright for their seemingly utopian fantasies, for believing in the value of social currency, business as a force for good, peaceful coexistence, among other fantastical illusions._

_Some called me a dreamer too when I launched_ SEE Change Magazine _with the belief that storytelling focused on social change and social good was a valuable endeavour, that providing a platform for inspirational stories about changemakers could help other fools gain the courage to follow their own dreams. But with social entrepreneurship on the constant rise and with readers asking for more content exploring that intersection of profit and purpose, can it be dreamers are actually onto something?_

_So, if you have a dream, embrace it and take every step possible to realize it. Don’t let fear or critics sway you. Start that business, pursue that innovation, do what you can to change the world, jump in deep, travel far, get your hands dirty, your feet wet, enter that contest, ask her out, speak up, shout out in the face of injustice. But, above all, believe in your dream because no one else will believe in it for you._

_Here’s to a New Year filled with dreams and foolish contemplation. Here’s to believing in the possibilities, in the pursuit of those things which may cause your heart to ache but fill you with wonder, vibrancy, life and love. Here’s to the ones who dream, foolish as they may seem._

Social TrendSpotters, I hope this optimistic message inspires you as much as it did me. I wish you the very best as you pursue your dreams for a better world in 2017, and hope you will share them with us.

To learn more about Elisa’s fantastic work with SEE Change Magazine, check it out, and I encourage you to subscribe to the free digital publication.

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question: Summarize everything relating to the theme of the film.

answer: The theme of the film is the need for dreamers and the importance of foolish pursuits. Damien Chazelle's desire to make the film was evidence of the necessity of dreamers, while Emma Stone and Ryan Gosling's characters challenged, beyond even the narrative of the film, the importance of dreams and foolish pursuits in the face of popular oppostion.

critique: It is omitted that the protagonists in the film face a similar predicament to the director, and the film is a testament to the power of foolish pursuits.

critique: The answer is not related to the theme of the film.

critique: The answer is a bit all over the place. It's missing some main points.

critique: "Emma Stone and Ryan Gosling's characters challenged, beyond even the narrative of the film, the importance of dreams and foolish pursuits in the face of popular oppostion." is inaccurate. The film never mentions this.

critique: The response contains extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: It is not necessary to mention the popular opposition.

critique: Chazelle wasn't mentioned to be a dreamer, he just believed in the power of foolish pursuits.

critique: It would be better to say that the movie is a tribute to the dreamers because it's a love letter to the kinds of dreams that society often mocks.

critique: The woman at the coffee shop who asks Mia to share a story is evidence that the film is an ode to the dreamer and that these dreamers are both foolish and necessary.

critique: The passage does not discuss the importance of foolish pursuits.

text: "Emma Stone and Ryan Gosling's characters challenged, beyond even the narrative of the film, the importance of dreams and foolish pursuits in the face of popular oppostion." is incoherent. It would be better to say they embodied the importance of dreams and foolish pursuits.

category: coherence

refinement: The theme of the film is the need for dreamers and the importance of foolish pursuits. Damien Chazelle's desire to make the film was evidence of the necessity of dreamers, while Emma Stone and Ryan Gosling's characters challenged, beyond even the narrative of the film, the importance of dreams and foolish pursuits in the face of popular oppostion.

question: Summarize everything concerning the film's actors.

answer: Mia is an actress who has practically disappointing auditions and moonlights as a barista. Sebastian is too a struggling musician and purist who'd rather lose money than play holiday jingle at a restaurant. Together, their destinies wind up intertwined. At first, Mia wants to leave her career behind as her auditions are continuously disappointing. Sebastian is preparing to open his own jazz club.

critique: The answer should mention that Mia and Sebastian are the film's main characters.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: "At first, Mia wants to leave her career behind as her auditions are continuously disappointing." - this is incorrect. The auditions were only disappointing that one time.

critique: The description of Mia and Sebastian are inaccurate.

critique: The answer is incorrect and the question is asking for the actors only.

critique: There is no evidence that Sebastian wants to open his own jazz club.

critique: The answer can be clearer on who is who.

critique: It is not stated that Mia wants to leave her career behind.

critique: The answer is not related to the question.

critique: Sebastian and Mia aren't the focus of the passage, so their career and personal information are irrelevant

critique: Mia does not want to leave her career behind, she dreams of leaving it behind, what she does in the movie and outside is separable

critique: The answer is too long and contains irrelevant information.

critique: It is omitted that Mia and Sebastian are the movie's other prominent characters.

critique: There is no evidence that Mia wants to leave her career behind.

text: The response should not say "Sebastian is too a struggling musician." Mia is an actress, not a musician. It should say, "Sebastian is a struggling musician"

refinement: Mia is an actress who has practically disappointing auditions and moonlights as a barista. Sebastian is too a struggling musician and purist who'd rather lose money than play holiday jingle at a restaurant. Together, their destinies wind up intertwined. At first, Mia wants to leave her career behind as her auditions are continuously disappointing. Sebastian is preparing to open his own jazz club.

question: What did Ryan Gosling have to say about the film?

answer: His character was of an old-school jazz musician, a purist with dreams of opening his own jazz club, who found playing holiday jingles at a restaurant to be selling-out.

critique: The answer does not answer the question.

critique: This is not what Ryan Gosling said about the film.

critique: The answer should mention that Gosling's character is also a purist.

critique: This is not what he said about the movie.

critique: The answer is not related to the question.

critique: The answer could be clearer in its pronoun use.

critique: The answer should mention that Gosling's character is also a dreamer.

critique: "who found playing holiday jingles at a restaurant to be selling-out." - this answer doesn't explain Gosling's experience about the movie's success.

critique: The answer should include a direct quote from Gosling's character.

critique: Gosling's personal thoughts are not relevant to the question.

text: Ryan Gosling does not comment in the article. The response should be "No answer"

refinement: His character was of an old-school jazz musician, a purist with dreams of opening his own jazz club, who found playing holiday jingles at a restaurant to be selling-out.

question: What does the article say about entrepreneurs?

answer: Although the author only talks about one entrepreneur, the message is clear: We need them, and we need them to dare greatly. The author thinks that many dreamers are discouraged from their pursuits due to the perceived "risk" and "unrewarding" nature of the endeavor.

critique: We don't know what Elisa Birnbaum has to say about dreamers.

critique: The article does not talk about one entrepreneur.

critique: It is omitted that the author believes that dreamers are valuable to society.

critique: "We need them, and we need them to dare greatly." - this is inaccurate. The author never said this.

critique: "We need them, and we need them to dare greatly." is irrelevant.

critique: The author doesn't talk about "many dreamers" but says that dreamers are the ones who change the world.

critique: The author doesn't mention that they only talk about one entrepreneur.

critique: There is no evidence that the author only talks about one entrepreneur.

critique: The author does not say that the dreamers are discouraged from their pursuits.

critique: The article doesn't talk about entrepreneurs.

critique: The author seems to be talking about social entrepreneurs.

critique: The author does not talk about entrepreneurs.

critique: The article doesn't discuss the challenges facing entrepreneurs.


text:
Damn. Now I really didn't see this happening. Of all the things to happen at this bland school and this is the shit that happens. Wow. I guess I'm getting a bit carried, let me start from the beginning.
          My school, Jefferson Middle School, is rather boring, nothing really exciting happens here except the occasional girl drama that usally goes like, "Brian likes me! Not you, skany hoe!" And ends in a matter of three days. I'm usually quiet, if you were to call me "popular girl," you would be wrong but calling me a "nerd" wouldn't be right either. I was just sort of there. I had my friends and that's all I needed. That's where this story starts. With my friend, Daniel. Daniel was a pretty intresting boy. All acceralted classes, loved video games and comics, and wasn't bad looking at all. Over the first year of middle school, Daniel and I became pretty close. Hanging out after school and learning about eachother. It was pretty nice. Daniel loved life and he wasn't afraid to show it. If he had something to say, oh would he say it, but he was never disrespectful about it. He was always being a gentlemen. People always said shit about him.
         "Oh! Did you hear about Daniel? I heard he was sucking cock in the bathroom!"
         "Daniel the fag!"
         "Daniel should go burn in fucking hell with all the other fags that enjoy buttsex!" Get the trend here? They kept on saying he was gay, over and over. Through messages on Facebook, notes, or even writing on bathroom walls, which is very cliche. There have been times where I have asked if he was gay and I would get the same answer every time.
          "Do you think I am?" Over and over, he never changed it. Daniel was really proud and he felt as if he shouldn't state if he were gay or not and I really admire that about him. 8th grade started and I assumed that the gay jokes would have gotten old by now, but they didn't. They actual got worse. More people started calling him a "fag, dick-sucker," and spreading rumors that I don't even wanna remember. I noticed a change in Daniel, he wasn't as outgoing, didn't speak his mind, became less quite, less proud. I tried helping him, I really did but it never worked. He seemed to just become more depressed. Those kids never noticed either, they just attacked him more and more, getting more ruthless with each insult. This drama was lasting way more than three days and I wasn't sure what would happen. Shit even got worsed.
          That's when I heard the intercom come on one day during class.
       "Students, I am sad to announce that our student, Daniel Rigsbee, has died yesterday." They didn't tell us how he died, but we all knew. He killed himself. The voice of the principal announcing his death was so fucking emotionless, it made it seem as if Daniel was some character in a movie that died. Everyone was silent. I was filled with anger. Those ruthless bastards did this. They didn't know when to stop. The minute the bell rang, I sprinted to his house asking if it was true was they said today. His father simply nodded and beckoned me in. He said that there was a note left in his room directed to me and "bitches." I walked to his room, feeling as if I was going to puke. I found the note, all directed in rainbows, colors, and smiley faces. It made me sick. I opened the note with nervoness and read.
        "Dear Juno and the son of bitches at school. Let me make this clear. I am not fucking gay. I am as straight as the pole your mom dances on. I should not have to tell people this, it's my life and you shouldn't be butting in. Pun intended. You caused this and I hope you feel great. You did it! You've killed me! I'm not gonna say that this wasn't your guys' fault because fuck that. It totally was. I hope you live with that burden that you killed me for your whole life. Juno, I hope you live a great life and don't cry over me, you didn't cause this. You are amazing and don't let people do what they did to me to you. I would punch their neck. (:
                                            Bye,
                                                  Daniel-Not fucking gay-Rigsbee
        What the fuck? That wasn't sad at all. This was the Daniel that I knew. He killed himself because he was done of the shit. I don't think he felt sorry or anything. I don't even know. As I turned to leave, I found something else. It was another note reading, "I hope this was exciting enough for you, Juno. I am a coward. I wasn't gonna deal with this anymore. They didn't win, remerber that. I won. They get to deal with my death. -Daniel"
         Fucking. Daniel.

title: Uhhmm...Well I'm 13 and I would like to be a writer when I get older so here's one of my short stories. Reviews? Be honest.

question: What does the story say about bullying?

answer: The author believes bullies didn't care about Daniel and that their bullying tactics might have made Daniel commit suicide. She believes the bullies are the ones who killed her friend. She points out that the bullies were unrelenting, and the only resolution he could find was to kill himself.

critique: The first sentence is a bit confusing. It would be better to say that the author believes bullies didn't care about Daniel and that their bullying tactics might have made him commit suicide.

question: Summarize the narrator's relationship with Daniel.

answer: Juno and Daniel are best friends and have been since 8th grade. She cares deeply for him. However, she didn't notice the student body's cruelty towards him. She was angry when she heard he committed suicide.

critique: The answer should mention that Daniel is the one who committed suicide.

critique: The narrator's anger at Daniel's death is omitted.

question: Summarize the school's reaction to Daniel's death.

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the school's reaction was emotionless.

question: What does the story say about the bullies' reaction to Daniel's note?

answer: No answer

critique: The response can include the actual content of the note because it's declared to be public in the story.

critique: The response is incorrect. The story does not say anything about the bullies' reaction to Daniel's note.

critique: The response is not related to the passage.

critique: The answer should mention that the bullies did not react to the note.

critique: The answer should mention that the bullies didn't have a reaction.

text: The answer should state that the story doesn't say anything about how the bullies reacted to Daniel's note.


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The SUN WORKSTATION was a modular computer system designed at Stanford University in the early 1980s. It became the seed technology for many commercial products, including the original workstations from Sun Microsystems.

History

In 1979 Xerox donated some Alto computers, developed at their Palo Alto Research Center, to Stanford's Computer Science Department, as well as other universities that were developing the early Internet. The Altos were connected using Ethernet to form several local area networks. The SUN's design was inspired by that of the Alto, but used lower-cost modular components.[1] The project name was derived from the initials of the campus' Stanford University Network.[2]

Professor Forest Baskett suggested the best-known configuration: a relatively low-cost personal workstation for computer-aided logic design work. The design created a 3M computer: a 1 million instructions per second (MIPS) processor, 1 Megabyte of memory and a 1 Megapixel raster scan bit-map graphics display. Sometimes the $10,000 estimated price was called the fourth “M” — a “Megapenny”.[3] Director of Computer Facilities Ralph Gorin suggested other configurations and initially funded the project. Graduate student Andy Bechtolsheim designed the hardware, with several other students and staff members assisting with software and other aspects of the project. Vaughan Pratt became unofficial faculty leader of the project in 1980.[4]

Three key technologies made the SUN workstation possible: very large-scale integration (VLSI) integrated circuits, Multibus and ECAD. ECAD (Electronic Computer Assisted Design, now known as Electronic design automation) allowed a single designer to quickly develop systems of greater complexity. The Stanford Artificial Intelligence Laboratory (SAIL) had pioneered personal display terminals, but the 1971 system was showing its age. Bechtolsheim used the Stanford University Drawing System (SUDS) to design the SUN boards on the SAIL system. SUDS had been originally developed for the Foonly computer.[5] The Structured Computer Aided Logic Design (SCALD) package was then used to verify the design, automate layout and produce wire-wrapped prototypes and then printed circuit boards.[6]

VLSI integrated circuits finally allowed for a high-level of hardware functionality to be included in a single chip. The graphics display controller was the first board designed, published in 1980.[7] A Motorola 68000 CPU, along with memory, a parallel port controller and a serial port controller, were included on the main CPU board designed by Bechtolsheim. The third board was an interface to the 2.94 Mbits/second experimental Ethernet (before the speed was standardized at 10 Mbits/second).[8] thumb |The three boards (plus memory extension) as later marketed by Sun Microsystems circa 1983

The Multibus computer interface made it possible to use standard enclosures, and to use circuit boards made by different vendors to create other configurations. For example, the CPU board combined with a multi-port serial controller created a terminal server (called a TIP, for Terminal Interface Processor) which connected many terminals to the Digital Equipment Corporation time-sharing systems at Stanford or anywhere on the Internet. Configuring multiple Ethernet controllers (including commercial ones, once they were available) with one CPU board created a router. William Yeager wrote the software, which was later adopted and evolved by Cisco Systems on its version of the hardware. Les Earnest licensed the CPU board for one of the first commercial low-cost laser printer controllers at a company called Imagen.[9] The processor board was combined with a prototype high performance graphics display by students of James H. Clark. That group later formed Silicon Graphics Incorporated.[10]

Eventually about ten SUN workstations were built during 1981 and 1982, after which Stanford declined to build any more. Bechtolsheim then licensed the hardware design to several vendors, but was frustrated that none of them had chosen to build a workstation.

Vinod Khosla, also from Stanford, convinced Bechtolsheim along with Scott McNealy to found Sun Microsystems in order to build the Sun-1 workstation, which included some improvements to the earlier design.[11]

Other faculty members who did research using SUN workstations included David Cheriton, Brian Reid, and John Hennessy.[12]

[1]  (Many words are spelled phonetically)

[2]  CSL Technical Report 229 (First author name is misspelled on cover)

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[6]  CSL Technical Report 201

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title: SUN workstation

question: Summarize an interest fact found in this text.

answer: The first use of the word 'cloud' in a thesis describes enabling an independent computing environment at one's place of the SUN.net appliance in 1992-93. Significant technological advances allowed more people to have more resources. The Google and Facebook clouds were not part of a solution, but were called into action as we were all creating a persistent interactive network. With cloud creations, businesses and providers can grow exponentially.

critique: This is not an interest fact to be found in the text.

critique: The first use of the word 'cloud' in a thesis describes the use of the SUN workstation.

critique: The response is not related to the question.

critique: A few of the words in this response aren't found in the text. The response needs to be re-written.

critique: The first use of the word 'cloud' in a thesis is not found in this text.

critique: The answer is nonsensical, which is a sign of a bad answer.

critique: This is not an interest fact in the text.

critique: The answer misattributes new research over a decade later.

critique: '...the Sun.net appliance in 1992-93. Significant technological advances allowed more people to have more resources.' is inaccurate. This should be edited in order to make sense.

critique: According to the article, the SUN (network) was not used in a thesis, but it could have suggested the possibility that it could have well done the idea.

question: How popular is the research conducted using the SUN workstation in present times?

answer: That information can't be found.

critique: The answer is wrong. The article does mention the research conducted using SUN workstations.

critique: Even if it can't be found, it can be assumed, though it is probably "no research"

critique: The article doesn't mention anything related to the popularity of the research.

critique: It is omitted that there is no evidence to suggest the research has stopped.

critique: There is some information, but it's not the answer to the question.

critique: The answer is wrong. The research is still being used.

critique: The answer is not stated in the article.

critique: This answer is not correct, as the passage does go into detail about who used the SUN workstation.

critique: This information can be found in the article.

critique: This answer misses the point of the question.

critique: The answer is not correct. The research conducted using the SUN workstation is still being used in present times.


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KID CREME (born NICOLAS SCARAVILLI, 1974)[1] is a house music producer and DJ, born to an Italian family in Brussels.

Biography

Kid Creme's formative years were spent learning to spin hip-hop and studying music theory and classic piano. After he was expelled from music college in 1991, he decided to set up his own home studio inspired mainly by the London breakbeat scene. At 19 he met Francis Shabard (DJ Murvin Jay) who introduced him to house music and together they secured DJ residencies at Club XXX, the first house club night in Brussels at the Theatre of Vaudeville.

Kid Creme spent four years as assistant engineer at Let's Go Studios, where he met his DJ partner and close friend Vito 'Junior Jack' Lucente. In 1994, Kid Creme set up his own label DTM Recordz and was offered a recording contract deal by R&S Records. At the same time Kid Creme was releasing house records through UK label Drop Dead Discs. It was Kid Creme's house remix of “Boom on Drop Dead” that caught Boy George's eye, and remixes for Junior Vasquez and Topazz followed.

PIAS offered Kid Creme a recording contract deal for his techno productions. He accepted the offer and now records for his label Deluxe Recordings under the moniker Sharpside. Their second release, “Critical Freaks”, gained support with Dave Angel, Claude Young, Pete Tong, Carl Cox and Judge Jules. With Danny Tenaglia supporting track “Belgian Resistance”, Luke Slater using the track “Telsco Drop” on his album and Space Cruising getting signed to Dave Angel's label, Kid Creme's techno productions were going from strength to strength.

In 2001, Kid Creme's first production under that name entitled Austin's Groove was signed to Jalapeño Records, who licensed it to Ink in the UK and Subliminal in the US. Eric Morillo added a Shawnee Taylor vocal on the record. Two following releases for Distinctive, “Niquid EP” and “Down & Under”, did equally well with critics and sales.

Kid Creme came back with a bootleg of Raw Silk's “Do It To the Music” and renamed it “Hypnotising”. The single was released by Positiva and reached number 31 in the UK Singles Chart.

Kid Creme's remix of “At Night”, a song by Shakedown, was _Seven_ magazine's 'Single Of The Week'. When Fatboy Slim played it at the Big Beach Boutique, he was watched by 250,000 people. Upon hearing it whilst visiting her label, Kylie Minogue asked Kid Creme to remix her single, “Love at First Sight”.

Discography

Singles

-   2000 “Austin's Groove”
-   2001 “Private Tools”
-   2003 “Down and Under”
-   2003 “Hypnotising”
-   2004 “Everybody”

Remixes

-   2002 Shakedown - At Night
-   2002 Kylie Minogue - “Love at First Sight”
-   2003 Pique & Nique - “You Will (Miss Me)”
-   2004 Planet Funk - Inside All The People

Mix compilations

-   2003 Junior Jack and Kid Creme In The House (Defected Records)

[1] Hey Mr DJ: What's the name?, _Times of India_ (May 30, 2010)

title: Kid Crème

question: What does the text say about Kid Crème's family?

answer: No answer

critique: The text mentions that Kid Crème was born to an Italian family in Brussels.

critique: The answer should mention that Kid Crème was born to an Italian family.

critique: The response misses to provide an answer to the instruction in the task.

critique: Kid Crème's family are not discussed in the article.

critique: The answer should mention his family's nationality.

critique: One can assume because it says 'born to an Italian family' that at least one member is an Italian national.

question: What does the text say about Kid Crème's early life and career?

answer: Kid Crème was born to an Italian family in Brussels. He was expelled from music college in 1991. He set up his own home studio inspired by the London breakbeat scene. He met Francis Shabard (DJ Murvin Jay) who introduced him to house music and together they secured DJ residencies at Club XXX, the first house club night in Brussels at the Theatre of Vaudeville. Kid Crème spent four years as assistant engineer at Let's Go Studios, where he met his DJ partner and close friend Vito 'Junior Jack' Lucente. In 1994, Kid Creme set up his own label DTM Recordz and was offered a recording contract deal by R&S Records. At the same time Kid Creme was releasing house records through UK label Drop Dead Discs. It was Kid Creme's house remix of “Boom on Drop Dead” that caught Boy George's eye, and remixes for Junior Vasquez and Topazz followed.

critique: The answer should mention his first production.

critique: The answer should mention his early career.

critique: The answer should mention his work with Pias.

critique: The answer should mention the recording contract Kid Creme received from Pias.

critique: Add that he eventually signed a contract with PIAS.

critique: The answer should mention his career as a house music producer and DJ.

critique: The answer is more about Kid Creme's career than his early life.

question: What does the text say about Kid Crème's career after Club XXX?

answer: Kid Crème's first production, Austin's Groove, was signed to Jalapeño Records in 2001. The single reached number 31 in the UK Singles Chart. One of his remixes was "At Night", which was "Seven" magazine's 'Single Of The Week'. Fatboy Slim heard Kid Crème's remix of "At Night" and asked Kid Crème to remix Kylie Minogue's single, "Love at First Sight".

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The response should include the name of Kid Crème's label.

critique: The answer does not mention his label DTM Recordz.

critique: The answer could mention his remix of "Hypnotising".

critique: The answer should mention some more specific details.

text:
The answer omits a lot of details.
-It fails to mention that he was the assistant engineer at Let's Go studios for four years and he was offered a recording contract deal by R&S Records in 1994.
-It also moits that Kid Creme released house records through the UK label Drop Dead Discs.
-It also omits the PIAS offered him a recording contract deal for his techno productions and now records for his label Deluxe Recordings under the moniker sharpside.
All these occurred after Creme's career with Club XXX and before Austin's Groove. The model should consider including these details.

question: What does the text say about the highlights of Kid Crème's career as a DJ?

answer: Kid Crème's remix of "At Night" was Seven magazine's "Single of the Week." Fatboy Slim played it at the Big Beach Boutique, and 250,000 people were watching. Kylie Minogue asked Kid Crème to remix her single, "Love at First Sight." Kid Crème's remix of "Do It To the Music" was released by Positiva and reached number 31 in the UK Singles Chart. Kid Crème's remix of "Hypnotising" was released by Positiva and reached number 31 in the UK Singles Chart.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The response inaccurately mentions Kid Crème's remix of "Hypnotising" was released by Positiva and reached number 31 in the UK Singles Chart. Kid Crème's remix of "Hypnotising" was released by Positiva and reached number 31 in the UK Singles Chart.

critique: The answer should mention the single "Hypnotising" by Raw Silk.

critique: While Kid Crème's remix of "Hypnotising" was released by Positiva and reached number 31 in the UK Singles Chart, it was not the same as the one that was released in 2003. The response should indicate this and remove mention of the year.

text:
The answer fails to mention that 'Do It To the Music' was Raw Silk's song he remixed and renamed 'Hypnotising.' It should state it this way.
The last sentence is redundant and should be removed.


text:
[The _Dionysus_ of the Palazzo Altemps, Rome]

The over-lifesize marble _DIONYSUS WITH PANTHER AND SATYR_ in the Palazzo Altemps,[1] Rome, is a Roman work of the 2nd century AD, found in the 16th century[2] on the Quirinal Hill at the time foundations were being dug for Palazzo Mattei at Quattro Fontane.[3] The statue was purchased for the Ludovisi collection, where it was first displayed in front of the _Palazzo Grande_, the main structure of the Villa Ludovisi, and by 1641 in the gallery of sculptures in the _Casino Capponi_ [4] erected for Cardinal Ludovico Ludovisi in the villa's extensive grounds. By 1885, it had been removed to the new Palazzo del Principe di Piombino, nearby in via Veneto. With the rest of the Boncompagni-Ludovisi collection, which was open to the public on Sundays and covered in the guidebooks,[5] and where it had become famous,[6] it was purchased in 1901 for the City of Rome, as the Ludovisi collection was dispersed and the Villa's ground built over at the end of the 19th century.

The formula, with somewhat exaggerated _contrapposto_, the god's right hand resting on his head, is based on the Apollo Lyceus, which is variously attributed and dated. This ivy-crowned Dionysus is accompanied by the panther that signalises his numinous presence, and a satyr of reduced size, a member of his retinue. Long locks of his hair fall girlishly over his shoulders and in his left hand he holds a bunch of grapes, emblematic of his status as god of wine.

The original elements are the heads, torsos and thighs of Dionysus and the satyr. The arms of the satyr and the lower legs and base are modern— that is, 16th-century— restorations.

Notes

[1] Inventory number 8606.

[2] It appeared in Giovan Battista Cavalieri, _Antiquarum Statuarum Urbis Romae tertius et quartus liber_, (Rome, 1594), plate 74.

[3] According to the tradition recorded by the sculptor-dealer and diarist Flaminio Vacca, _Memorie di varie antichità trovate in diversi luoghi della citta di Roma_, Rome, 1704, (memoria 37).

[4] Gruppo colossale di Dionisio e satiro: description, history, conservation, bibliography

[5] (Octavian Blewitt) _Handbook for travellers in central Italy_ (Murray), Part II, 1853, _s.v._ “Rome §79 Villas” etc.

[6] “The youthful, or so-called Theban Bacchus, was carried to ideal beauty by Praxiteles... The finest statue of this kind is in the villa Ludovisi” (William Smith, _A New Classical Dictionary of Greek and Roman Biography, Mythology and Geography_, 1871, _s.v._ “Dionysus”); “...the eyes most intense and soft; the hair in curls, close to the head, brown with streaks of gold, strangely resembling the hair of some Greek statue — perhaps the Ludovisi Bacchus...” (William Francis Barry, _Arden Massiter_, 1900, p. 16.)

title: Ludovisi Dionysus

question: Why is the work named as the Ludovisi Dionysus?

answer: The statue was a gift from the Ludovisi family to Cardinal Ludovico Ludovisi in 1641.

critique: It was purchased by the Cardinal, not given as a gift.

critique: It was still in the villa's extensive grounds when it was purchased for Rome in 1901.

critique: The statue was not a gift to Cardinal Ludovico Ludovisi.


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[RiverPalooza]

Join your Upper Potomac Riverkeeper to experience the Antietam like you have never experienced before. History shrouds the Antietam Creek with the National Battlefield along its banks and the many stone arched bridges that cross the river. The day will begin at the visitor’s center with a movie and National Park Service (NPS) guided tour of the Antietam National Battlefield. Then, our NPS guide will join us as we meet up with the outfitters near the Burnside Bridge Rd access and float to the confluence of the Potomac. Our lively guide will educate and entertain you with history and stories of the Antietam but the guided trip is only the teaser compared to this beautiful beginner white water river where each turn will bring you excitement and wonder. Help us celebrate the Antietam Creek and the importance of keeping its waters clean as part of Potomac Riverkeeper Network’s RiverPalooza 2017!

[]OUTFITTER: River and Trail Outfitters

ARRIVAL LOCATION:
Antietam National Battlefield Visitor Center
5831 Dunker Church Road
Sharpsburg, MD 21782

ARRIVAL TIME: 9:30 AM at the visitor center, we will be on the creek by noon.  Paddlers should plan to be off the water by 4:00 PM

PADDLE LEVEL: Beginner/intermediate

PADDLE DISTANCE: 6 miles/3 hrs

BOAT OPTIONS AND COSTS:

-   Canoe rental: $40 per canoe, $25 registration fee for the renter and/or passenger. (This is a $126 value)
-   Single Kayak: $55 per kayak for one person ($111 value)
-   BYOB (Bring Your Own Boat): $50 per boat for the shuttle. ($96 value)

Free RiverPalooza T-shirt to first 10 registrants!

OPTIONAL ACTIVITY:
Camping before and after at Harpers Ferry Adventure Center (HFAC) [Contact center for reservations. Located at 37410 Adventure Center Lane, Purcellville, VA 20130 Phone: (540) 668-9007]

PARTICIPANT LIMIT: 30 People

_EVERY PADDLE PARTICIPANT must print, fill out and bring their ACA waiver with them on the day of the event. Depending on your trip, you may also need to bring an outfitter waiver. Please see your confirmation email for details._

 ACATripWaiver_adult    ACATripWaiver_minor    River and Trails waiver

Follow us on social media at #RiverPalooza2017

_Potomac Riverkeeper Network is not responsible for securing camping reservations or for the safety and enjoyment of participants who wish to attend. Trip times are subject to change or cancellation due to inclement weather, high river levels, tidal fluctuations, wind and other factors that could jeopardize safety and enjoyment of participants. Unfortunately, there can be no refunds. Potomac Riverkeeper Network is not responsible for any personal property that may be lost, damaged, or stolen during the trip. Potomac Riverkeeper Network is not responsible for limited camping, outfitter service, lengthy paddle distances, late start times and uncontrollable weather that could potentially prohibit/limit our ability to provide an enjoyable and safe paddling experience._

_[]RIVERPALOOZA_ IS A WATERKEEPER ALLIANCE SPLASH SERIES EVENT, PRESENTED NATIONALLY BY TOYOTA AND LOCALLY BY THE NATIONAL PARK SERVICE AND MOM’S ORGANIC MARKET.

question: What does the article say about the Antietam National Battlefield?

answer: The Antietam National Battlefield is a historical site that is home to the Antietam Creek. The battlefield has many stone arched bridges that cross the river. The Antietam National Battlefield is also home to the visitor's center where a movie and NPS guided tour of the battlefield is shown.

critique: The answer could include more details about the battlefield.

critique: The answer could mention the Antietam Creek.

critique: The Antietam National Battlefield is not home to the Antietam Creek.

critique: This answer is repetitive and verbose way over the one that can be provided for this question since the Antietam National Battlefield is already established in the question.

critique: The answer should mention the Antietam Creek.

question: What does the article say about RiverPalooza activities?

answer: The article includes the amounts for boat rentals for canoes or sit-on kayaks. There's also a description of a guided tour of canoeing at Antietam Creek.

critique: The answer should mention the optional activity, camping.

critique: The answer should mention the optional camping.

critique: The answer omits the optional activity of camping.

critique: The answer should mention the optional camping activity.

critique: It's omitted that field trip is done by the Riverkeeper Network at one of their events. They schedule the event, coordinate reserves, and schedule for activities for the participants.

question: What does the article say about Potomac Riverkeeper Network's disclaimer?

answer: The disclaimer provides a waiver for riverloadsa and may require other waivers for particular activities, depending on the trip. It asks for AAA waivers for some activities as well. It says that this waiver isn't a way to secure any personal property, as losses due to unforeseen activities are not punishable. However, there is no way to ensure that this disclaimer isn't a lie.

critique: The answer is incoherent and nonsensical.

critique: Though possibly unintentional, the response is also a little rude. The questions on the waiver clearly aren't burdensome, so it appears that it is necessary to allow room for when trouble happens, and not just an attempt to save potential money.

critique: The answer is not related to the disclaimer.

critique: The answer is confusing and nonsensical.

critique: The article does not mention AAA waivers.

text: The sentence saying the disclaimer may be a lie is completely irrelevant and unnecessary commentary.

question: What does the article say about how to keep the river clean?

answer: No answer

critique: The article does mention how to keep the river clean.