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_SHOTGUN STORIES_ is a 2007 drama film about a feud between two sets of half-brothers following the death of their father in rural Arkansas. The film was written and directed by Jeff Nichols, and stars Michael Shannon, Barlow Jacobs, Michael Abbott Jr. and Glenda Pannell.

Plot summary

Son Hayes (Michael Shannon) wakes up and gets dressed, revealing that he has scars from a shotgun blast on his back. He meets his younger brothers, Boy (Douglas Ligon) and Kid (Barlow Jacobs), who live in a van and a tent respectively, saying that his wife Annie has left him over his gambling habit and inviting them to live in his house. Son and Kid earn meager livings at a fish farm, where workers take bets on how Son received his scars; Boy is an unsuccessful basketball coach at the local middle school. One night, while Son is researching his gambling system, the boys' estranged mother arrives to announce that their estranged father (from whom she has long been divorced) has just died.

The brothers crash the funeral, where their father's second family is mourning. Son delivers a scathing commentary on their father, especially for callously abandoning them to be raised by their hateful mother, while going off to lovingly raise a second set of sons meanwhile forgetting, for the most part, his first set of sons. In the process, Son nearly starts a brawl with his four half-brothers. The eldest half-brother, Mark (Travis Smith), vows revenge and starts a chain of violent confrontations. Meanwhile, Annie returns and tries to salvage her relationship with Son, but Son is unwilling to give up gambling. Kid plans on marrying his girlfriend, Cheryl, should he get an expected raise, but worries about providing for her and staying faithful. After Mark kills Boy's dog by leaving a poisonous snake in its water bowl, Kid attacks and kills Mark, but is himself severely injured in the fight and dies in the hospital. Son and Boy are unaware that Mark's brothers Stephen and John were involved in the fight until after Kid's funeral, when an acquaintance named Shampoo tells them. Son then goes to their mother, who is coldly indifferent to everything that is happening, to inform her that Kid has just died, while condemning her for raising her sons to be full of hate toward their half-brothers, before leaving her for the last time.

The confrontations between the remaining brothers escalate, with Son on one side and John and Stephen Hayes on the other side unwilling to let the matter rest, despite their brother Cleaman's attempts to stop the feud. Son and Boy invade their half-brothers' farm and attack Stephen, but are interrupted and hospitalized by the remaining family and other farm workers. Annie and Cheryl are left grieving and bewildered by the continued fighting. Boy purchases a shotgun and holds Cleaman at gunpoint, but hesitates after seeing the man's sons, and leaves. Boy expresses worry that Son will kill himself trying to protect him from the half-brothers. He recalls how Son received his scars while protecting him and Kid.

The second family arms themselves with shotguns on their farm, bracing for a shootout. Boy arrives at the farm unarmed and states that he is done fighting, offering a truce. The less combative half-brothers force Stephen to accept the truce, but he worries that Son will not hold to the agreement. Afterwards, Son awakens from his coma. Boy returns to Son, who recuperates from his injuries. The movie ends with the beginning of fall, with Cleaman seeing his youngest brother John off to college, Boy coaching again, and Son living at home with Annie and their son, Carter. The final scene of the movie shows Son and Boy enjoying a peaceful afternoon on the porch with Carter.

Cast

-   Son Hayes – Michael Shannon
-   Boy Hayes – Douglas Ligon
-   Kid Hayes – Barlow Jacobs
-   Nicole – Natalie Canerday
-   Annie Hayes – Glenda Pannell
-   Stephen Hayes – Lynnsee Provence
-   Cleaman Hayes – Michael Abbott Jr.
-   Mark Hayes – Travis Smith
-   Shampoo Douglas – G. Alan Wilkins

Critical reception

_Shotgun Stories_ has positive reviews, earning an 90% “Certified Fresh” rating at Rotten Tomatoes from 48 reviews, with an average rating of 7.29/10.[1]

It appeared on several critics' top ten lists of the best films of 2008. Bill White of the _Seattle Post-Intelligencer_ named it the best film of 2008, Philip Martin of the _Arkansas Democrat-Gazette_ named it the 3rd best film of 2008, David Edelstein of _New York_ magazine named it the 8th best film of 2008, and Roger Ebert of _Chicago Sun-Times_ named it one of the best films of the year.[2]

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title: Shotgun Stories

question: Summarize the critical reception that Shotgun Stories has received.

answer: Shotgun Stories has favorable reviews, earning an 90% 'Certified Fresh' rating by Rotten Tomatoes from 48 reviews. They gave an average rating of 7.29/10. The critics who have written about the film, have all fallen in love with the emotion and complexity of the story, besides the film's lyrical and beautiful cinematography. They praised the characterizations of the characters, the direction and writing, the music, sound and editing. Shortcomings are that they claim the film suffers from a weak and undeveloped third act.

critique: The answer is not related to the question.

critique: The third act is not the only part of the film criticized.

critique: 'Shortcomings are that they claim the film suffers from a weak and undeveloped third act.' is irrelevant

critique: This response is not relevant to the question, and it is not a critique.

critique: The citation numbers have to be used instead of writing out the full names of the writers.

critique: The response contains sentences not related to the task.

critique: It's omitted that Shotgun Stories appeared on several critics' top ten lists of the best films of 2008.

critique: Perhaps add an explanation as to how many critics liked the film.

question: Summarize the boy's (Son, Douglas, and Kid) relationship with their father, as according to the film's plot.

answer: Son is cold to him and goes so far as testifying at his funeral about what an awful person and father he was. Son seems to have inherited that; as evidenced by his giving of his father's boys wages to his second family, who he had abandoned by then. The father did not care about the first family either, as much as he did for the second; namely his second wife and the four boys he had with her.

critique: Son is cold to him and goes so far as testifying at his funeral about what an awful person and father he was. Son seems to have inherited that; as evidenced by his giving of his father's kids' wages to his second family, who he had abandoned by then. The father did not care about the first family either, as much as he did for the second; namely his second wife and the four boys he had with her.

critique: It's inaccurate to state that Son gives his father's boys wages to his second family.

critique: It would be better to specify the father is their deceased in the next part: Son is cold to him and goes so far as testifying at his funeral about what an awful person and father he was. Son seems to have inherited that; as evidenced by his giving of his father's wages to his second family, who he had abandoned by then. The father did not care about the first family either, as much as he did for the second; namely his second wife and the four boys he had with her. After he died, they visit the funeral, the father's new family attacks them, and the youngest steals their father's gun, giving the brothers their dead father's shotgun.

critique: The father did not give his wages to his second family.

critique: The father did not abandon the boys to their mother, but rather divorced her.

critique: Son gives his father's money to the second family, not the first.

critique: There is no evidence in the text to suggest Son gave the second family his father's wages.

critique: Missing word: Son, Douglas, and Kid refer to their father as a "hateful mother"

critique: The father's second family is not mentioned in the film.

critique: Son's giving the second family his father's wages is not evidence that he is cold to his father

critique: The text makes no mention of Son's father's wages.

critique: There is no evidence for the father giving Son's wages to the second family.

question: How would the movie have turned out if Son and Boy did not resolve their issues?

answer: Though it is not described in the article, if the remaining brothers are unable to resolve their issues, it could be assumed that the movie would end differently, or not at all.

critique: The story ends with the brothers resolving their issues.

critique: The point of the last two sentences of the answer is unclear.

critique: The scenario described in the question is not a given--it cannot be assumed what would happen "if the remaining brothers are unable to resolve their issues"

critique: The answer is not related to the question.

critique: The answer is not true. The article does not describe what would happen if they did not resolve their issues.

critique: The article does describe what happens in the movie

critique: The answer is not supported by the passage.

critique: This answer is not related to the question and must be rewritten.

critique: "If the remaining brothers are unable to resolve their issues, it could be assumed that the movie would end differently, or not at all." - this is conjecture. There is no evidence to suggest they would not resolve their issues. Rather, it would be the humans that cannot resolve their issues.

text: The question is already asking for an example of how the movie would end differently, so the answer should give a hypothetical example of this instead of stating the fact that it would end differently.

refinement: Though it is not described in the article, if the remaining brothers are unable to resolve their issues, it could be assumed that the movie would end differently, or not at all.


split: train

text:
     I slowly drift off into space, blackness, nothing. The sweet embrace of nothingness, it hugs me ever so gently, caresses my skin ever so softly. The comfort of the feeling is unmatched by anything, more passionate than a lovers embrace, but yet more gentle than a mother holding her new born baby. I am clear; it is an escape from the hustle and bustle of the everyday, the ups and downs, ins and outs, the busy that we all deal with every day. I am floating on a cloud of joy.
     White and fluffy, I float through the sky with the greatest of ease. It dances and prances through the endless blue, no destination in sight no nothing around.  The soft cotton form of the cloud brushes me lulling me into a state of relaxation, the feeling of a warm towel on a cold winter’s day. The dew drops drip down draining away all my daily dilemmas as I slip from consciousness to the world of the unknown where anything is possible and everything is alright.
      Still I am on my cloud, floating free through the sky. But I begin to sink towards the earth away from the warmth of the sun. As I descend the dew drops that dripped away my problems grow cold. The warm towel is gone and along with it the relaxation has disappeared. I am cold. As the cloud deepens in its descent the dew drops drip more and more and they turn into rain. The cloud I am on is no longer alone. Grey ominous clouds surround me on all sides, up, down, left, right, front, back all around.  There is no seeing where I am going. What lies ahead? My soft white cloud begins to shrink and fade into the background of the grey storm clouds. It grows smaller and smaller and I am no longer caressed by its beauty, but frightened by its disappearance as I continue to fall into the grey abyss.
      My cloud is gone, but I am not falling. I am standing. It’s solid ground.  Green grass grows around my bare feet. It is unkempt, filled with weeds and gravel that scratch the bare bottoms of my feet. I am compelled to walk; up a gently sloping hill and with no destination in sight. The storm clouds that surround me open up and the heavens rain down. Still I continue up this hill as my tattered clothes become saturated.  The grass is dying, dying, dead.  Only the weeds remain, through the mud and the gravel that cut my now bloody feet. I continue up the hill as my feet bleed and are rubbed raw.
     All around me are tombstones and I continue up the hill.  First one, two, three, four, five. I loose count. They are all around me on this hill, tombstones for no one. No names, no faces, dates, empty.  They belong to the masses, the nondescript, unoriginal people, who have all died their own individually common horrible death. And I continue on my march.
      I fall to my hands and knees and they both begin to bleed as the gravel rubs them to a state of ground beef, but still I march. My destination is close, although I still do not know what it is. The tombstones grow, what was once small headstones no higher than my knee grow to tower over me like skyscrapers. They look down upon me with their blank nameless faces. Watching me struggle up the hill as my clothes become more tattered and my shirt soaks with blood and rain. Death is watching.
     I find him, my father near the top of the hill, but not quite at the peak. He is not an old man, but not young either. He is how I know him to be, of good health and middle aged. The sides of his hair are white, but on top there remain some black remnants of his youth. He is laying down holding his stomach. Grasping, clutching, pulling at his stomach. I want to run to him, but can’t.  I continue slowly up the hill. Falling, scraping my forearms, then my elbows and up my arms until I finally fall on my face only to arise a bloody mess at my father’s side.
       I see now what he is holding. He looks worse than I. His hands, feet, knees, face, everything is filthy; covered in a combination of both mud and blood. The filth washes down his body until it reaches his hands. His mangled hands that have seen the work of a thousand men. Bent, shaking, cold.  His hands hold, grasp, clutch at his stomach. His black shirt torn open below the navel. His hands cover something and I move closer to see. He is not holding his stomach, but holding it in.  Where am cut with tiny scratches that bleed with the rain he has one stretching from side to side and through pour his entrails. Green, purple, orange, red with blood they pour out as he tries to hold them in. I cradle my father. His head in my right arm as my left hand works with his to keep his intestines inside, but they pour out. And I see my hand it is just as mangled as his. Cut, twisted warped into all shapes; broken one thousand times over; it shivers too much to hold anything and they slip out through our mangled fingers.
     Slowly and painfully through the hands of my father and I they slip out. Pouring onto the filth that now surrounds us they slip out. My father does not make a sound. He is staring straight into my eyes, looking up at me, his only son, holding him as he approaches death in this graveyard of nameless men. There are no words, only the sound of my father taking his last dying breath.
      And I wake up, just like every night, crying, alone in the dark.

title: The first story I've written

question: What does the story say about the protagonist's dream about his father?

answer: The protagonist dreams about his father being buried in a graveyard. He dreams of being on a cloud, falling down a hill with his father's intestines spilling out as he tries to hold them in. He sees his hand is just as mangled as his father's and he is covered in blood. He wakes up crying.

critique: The protagonist's father is not buried in a graveyard.

text: It is not stated that he falls down.

category: accuracy


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COPPENHALL is a small settlement in Staffordshire, England. Coppenhall lies southwest of Stafford and NNW of Penkridge with Baron Stafford as lord of the manor.[1] The parish of ~ is bounded on the east by the Pothooks Brook. The centre of the village lies at 416 ft (127 m) above sea level, the ground rising from about 275 ft (84 m) in the east of the parish to over 475 ft (145 m) in the west.

[Coppenhall Church, April 2008]

Church of St Lawrence

The small ancient church of St. Lawrence, built c.1200, and described by Pevsner as “a perfect 13th century village church, small but of great dignity,”[2] is constructed of thick sandstone walls with a spired wooden bellcote, and has capacity for only about 60 worshippers. It was made a chapelry of Penkridge parish after the Poor Law Amendment Act of 1834. The church registers commence in 1678 and are deposited at Staffordshire Record Office.[3]

A church existed at Coppenhall by 1200, it being a dependency of Penkridge College by 1261, having also had a vicarage ordained by 1291.

[The spired bell tower and cockerel wind vane of Coppenhall church, May 2008]

The church was extensively restored in 1866, which involved fitting a new roof, repairs to the windows and gable-ends and the addition of a new circular window to the east gable. A new bell turret was also added with a taller spire, and a stone pulpit and circular font were installed at this time. In 1917, a memorial pulpit and lectern were bequeathed in memory of Charles Mort by his widow Helen. In 1932, an oak lych-gate was added in memory of Charles H and Lillie Wright.[4]

Butterhill

Close to Coppenhall is the tiny hamlet of Butterhill, which possesses a semi-derelict red-brick windmill [5] standing on a small hill.[6] The windmill has been a Grade II listed building since 1986.[7] This windmill “standing on high ground some 150 yards west of Butterhill Farm and locally said to have been the only six-sail mill in the county, was in use by 1820. About 1849 it was part of Lord Hatherton's estate in Coppenhall occupied by William Handy. It seems to have gone out of use between 1872 and 1876, but the tackle was not removed until 1912. The derelict brick tower probably dates from c.1800.”[8]

Also nearby stands Butterhill House, a 3-storey Georgian house with a large south-facing glasshouse or Orangery. [9] [10] Butterhill House was owned by the Marson family in the 19th century and then passed to the Busby family who still lived there in 1900. Mrs. A. J. Busby was one of the chief landowners in Coppenhall in 1912 and 1916, but between at least 1924 and 1932 Butterhill House was owned and occupied by T. P. Darlington. Miss Darlington was living there in 1940. The house was sold in 1955 to Mr. A. N. Hillier, who had converted it by 1956 into flats. It is a mid-19th-century brick building with gabled dormers, ornamental barge-boards, and stone bay windows. It also has a large walled garden to the north.[11] The house has for some years now been a residential care home for the elderly.[12]

[1] _History, Gazetteer and Directory of Staffordshire,_ William White, Sheffield, 1851

[2] N Pevsner, _Buildings of England: Staffordshire,_ Harmonsworth/Penguin, 1974, p.108

[3] History of Coppenhall

[4] L. Margaret Midgley (editor), _A History of the County of Stafford: Volume 5 - East Cuttlestone Hundred,_ Victoria County History, UK, 1959, pp.141-143

[5] Picture of Butterhill windmill

[6] _Butterhill Windmill_

[7] _Windmill Tower North West of Butterhill Farmhouse, Coppenhall_

[8] L Margaret Midgley, _A History of the County of Stafford: Volume 5, Coppenhall,_ pp.138-143

[9] Picture of Butterhill House, 1964

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[11] L Margaret Midgley, _A History of the County of Stafford: Volume 5, Coppenhall,_ pp.138-143

[12] _Butterhill House_

title: Coppenhall

question: What does the text say about the Church of St Lawrence's construction in Coppenhall?

answer: The church was constructed in the 1300's. It had thick sandstone walls. A wooden bell cote and has a capacity for 60 worshippers. It was once an ancient village church. The church was renovated in 1866, during which new windows and then, a new bell tower was constructed, replacing the old one. A memorial pulpit and lectern were added, and in 1932 an oak lych gate was added.

critique: The answer is incorrect in several ways. The church was built in the 1200s, not the 1300s. The church was not renovated in 1866, but restored. The bell tower was not constructed in 1866, but in 1917. The lych gate was not added in 1932, but in 1932.

critique: "The church was constructed in the 1300's." - this is incorrect. The church was built around 1200.

critique: The church was built in the 1200s, not the 1300s.

critique: The answer should mention the date of construction.

critique: "A wooden bell cote" - replace "cote" with "cote"


text:
COMPUTER-ASSISTED LEGAL RESEARCH (CALR)[1] or COMPUTER-BASED LEGAL RESEARCH is a mode of legal research that uses databases of court opinions, statutes, court documents, and secondary material. Electronic databases make large bodies of case law easily available. Databases also have additional benefits, such as Boolean searches, evaluating case authority, organizing cases by topic, and providing links to cited material. Databases are available through paid subscription or for free.[2]

Subscription-based services include Westlaw, LexisNexis, JustCite, HeinOnline, Bloomberg Law, VLex and LexEur. As of 2015 the commercial market grossed $8 billion.[3] Free services include OpenJurist, Google Scholar, AltLaw, Ravel Law,[4] WIPO Lex, Law Delta and the databases of the Free Access to Law Movement.

Purposes

Computer-assisted legal research is undertaken by a variety of actors. It is taught as a topic on many law degrees[5] and is used extensively by undergraduate and postgraduate law students in meeting the work requirements of their degree courses. Professors of Law rely on the digitisation of primary and secondary sources of law when conducting their research and writing the material that they submit for publication. Professional lawyers rely on computer-assisted legal research in order to properly understand the status of the law and so to act effectively in the best interest of their client. They may also consult the text of case judgements and statutes specifically, as well as wider academic comment, in order to form the basis of (or response to) an appeal.

The availability of legal information online differs by type, jurisdiction and subject matter. The types of information available include:[6]

1.  Texts of statutes, statutory instruments, civil codes, etc.
2.  Explanatory notes and government publications relating to statutes and their operation
3.  Texts of governing documents such as constitutions and treaties
4.  Case judgements
5.  Journals on legal matters or legal theory
6.  Dictionaries and legal encyclopaediæ
7.  Legal texts and materials in the form of e-books
8.  Current affairs and market information
9.  Educational information on the law and its operation

Before the Internet

Prior to the advent and popularisation of the World Wide Web, access to digital legal information was largely through the use of CD-ROMs, designed and sold by commercial organisations.[7] Dial-up services were also available from the 1970s.[8] As the use of the Internet spread in the early 1990s, companies such as LexisNexis and Westlaw incorporated Internet connectivity into their software packages. Browser-based legal information started to be published by Legal Information Institutes from 1992.[9]

Publicly available information

The first effort to provide free computer access to legal information was made by two academics, Peter Martin and Tom Bruce, in 1992.[10] Today, the Legal Information Institute freely publishes such resources as the text of the United States Constitution, judgements of the United States Supreme Court, and the text of the United States Code.

The Australasian Legal Information Institute (AusLII) was established soon after in 1995.[11] Other legal information institutes, such as those of Great Britain and Ireland (BAILII), Canada (CII) and South Africa (SAfLI) soon followed.[12] LIIs were partially formalised in 2002 following the signing of the Declaration of Free Access to the Law, which has been signed by 54 countries.[13] At the time of writing, the World Legal Information Institute contains in excess of 1800 databases from 123 jurisdictions.[14]

Many governments also publish legal information online. For example, UK legislation and statutory instruments have been publicly available online since 2010.[15] Depending on the jurisdiction in question, the decisions of higher appellate courts may also be published online, either by the Legal Information Institute or by the court service directly.[16] Sources of European Union Law are published for free by EUR-Lex in 23 languages, including judgements of the European Courts.[17] Similarly, judgements of the European Court of Human Rights are published on its website.[18]

Commercially available information

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[2] Kate Marquess, Caught in the Web: Survey Reveals Increasing Use of Internet in Law Practices, but Lawyers Are Making Transition Slowly, A.B.A. J., Dec. 2000, at 76.

[3]

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[5] James Holland and Jullian Webb, _Learning Legal Rules_ (7th edn., Oxford University Press, 2010)

[6] See e.g. http://legalresearch.westlaw.co.uk/; http://www.lexisnexis.co.uk/en-uk/home.page; http://www.legislation.gov.uk; https://www.jstor.org

[7] The “free access to law movement” in India: supporting legal education, research and practice Priya Rai and Akash Singh (2015) Legal Information Management 178

[8] Archived February 28, 2008, at the Wayback Machine

[9] LII/Legal Information Institute, Cornell University https://www.law.cornell.edu/

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[11] “Electronic Law Journals – JILT 1997 (2) – AustLII's roles”. University of Warwick. Retrieved 4 March 2010.

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[13] Sarah Glassmeyer and Pete Smith, 'Open Law: technology in service of the rule of law' (2014) Legal Information Management 181

[14] http://www.worldlii.org/ accessed: 16th June 2016

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[16] See e.g. https://www.supremecourt.uk/decided-cases/

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title: Computer-assisted legal research

question: What does the text say about the purposes of using computers to aid legal research?

answer: The purpose of using computers to engage in legal research is to gather information about the law and prepare oneself to navigate the process of legal research and seeking out information. It's also used by the law practitioners to practice the law and make sure "to act effectively in the best interest of their client." It has several benefits such as Boolean search and organization of case law by topic. The type and volume of available information would differ depending on the jurisdiction and subject matter and depends on whether it's in text or audio format. In the past, access to digital legal information was available through CD-ROMs but with the advent of the internet, companies such as LexisNexis and Westlaw incorporated internet connectivity into their software package.

critique: There is a distinction between the different types of legal researchers

critique: "The type and volume of available information would differ depending on the jurisdiction and subject matter and depends on whether it's in text or audio format. In the past, access to digital legal information was available through CD-ROMs but with the advent of the internet, companies such as LexisNexis and Westlaw incorporated internet connectivity into their software package." These sentences are unnecessary information and should be removed.

critique: The answer should mention that the text also says that it's used by law students.

critique: The last sentence is not necessary and should be omitted.

critique: The last sentence is irrelevant to the question.

critique: The answer is a bit too long and should be re-written.

critique: The answer includes irrelevant information.

critique: The information about volume and format of available information is irrelevant to the question.

critique: The answer is repetitive and could be more concise.

critique: The last sentence is unnecessary as it doesn't explain the purposes of computer-assisted legal research

critique: The benefits introduced in the second half of the response to the first half cannot be found in the text.

critique: The answer is a bit long and could be more concise.

critique: The answer is too long and should be rewritten to be more concise.

question: What does the text say about how digital legal information was accessed prior to the internet?

answer: Prior to the advent of the World Wide Web, access to digital legal information was largely through the use of CD-ROMs that were designed and then sold by commercial organizations. Dial-up services were also available in the 1970s for accessing information. As the internet grew in the early 1990s commercially available legal information providers began to add internet connectivity to their software.

critique: The answer omits the first free effort to provide computer access to legal information.

critique: "As the internet grew in the early 1990s commercially available legal information providers began to add internet connectivity to their software." - this is irrelevant

critique: The answer should mention the first effort to provide free computer access to legal information.

critique: "Dial-up services were also available in the 1970s for accessing information." - this is incorrect. Dial-up services were available in the 1970s but not for accessing legal information.

critique: "Dial-up services were also available in the 1970s for accessing information" is not something the text emphasizes.

critique: "Dial-up services" does not make it easy to understand what is meant. The sentence should be rephrased.

critique: The answer should mention that the first effort to provide free computer access to legal information was made by two academics.

critique: The answer misses to mention that the first effort to provide free computer access to legal information was made by two academics in 1992.

critique: It is omitted that the first effort to provide free computer access to legal information was made in 1992 by two academics, Peter Martin and Tom Bruce.

critique: "Dial-up services were also available in the 1970s for accessing information. As the internet grew in the early 1990s commercially available legal information providers began to add internet connectivity to their software." - this is incorrect. This is outdated information and should be removed.

critique: The response does not adequately answer the question and does not mention the work of Martin and Bruce.

critique: The answer omits the first free database, which was created by two academics in 1992.

question: What does the text say about limitations of computer-assisted legal research?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer is incorrect. The text does discuss limitations of computer-assisted legal research.

critique: No, because the article is about the limitations of computer-assisted legal research.

critique: Does not examine the limitations of computer-assisted research that result from the free services.

critique: The answer should mention the limitations of CALR.

critique: No answer is provided in the text, however there must be any limitations of CALR.


text:
JEFFREY SCOTT RAIKES (born May 29, 1958) is the co-founder of the Raikes Foundation. He retired from his role as the chief executive officer of the Bill & Melinda Gates Foundation in 2014.[1] He serves on the boards of Giving Tech Labs,[2] Hudl[3] Costco Wholesale,[4] the Jeffrey S. Raikes School of Computer Sciences and Management at the University of Nebraska-Lincoln,[5] and the Microsoft Alumni Network. He is Chair of the Stanford University Board of Trustees.[6] Until early 2008, Raikes was the President of the Microsoft Business Division and oversaw the Information Worker, Server & Tools Business and Microsoft Business Solutions Groups.[7] He joined Microsoft in 1981 as a product manager.[8] He retired from Microsoft in September 2008, after a transitional period, to join the Gates Foundation.[9] He also held roles managing the company's sales force and services groups.

Early life

Raikes grew up in Ashland, Nebraska, graduating from Ashland-Greenwood High School in 1976. Raikes prepared to work for the US Department of Agriculture on agricultural policy while earning his Bachelor of Science degree in Engineering-Economics Systems (EES) from Stanford University.[10] It was while at Stanford that Raikes had his first exposure to computing, learning Pascal on a DEC System 20. The first computer he bought was an Apple II, which he used to help his brother, Ron Raikes, manage the family farm.

Career

He joined Apple Computer as the VisiCalc Engineering Manager in 1980. He worked at Apple for 15 months before being recruited to Microsoft by Steve Ballmer in 1981 as a product manager. He was promoted to director of Applications Marketing in 1984 and was the chief strategist behind Microsoft's investments in graphical applications for the Apple Macintosh and the Microsoft Windows operating system. In this role, he drove the product strategy and design of Microsoft Office. Raikes was promoted to vice president of Office Systems, where he was responsible for development and marketing of word processing, workgroup applications and pen computing.[11]

He later held roles managing North American operations, and worldwide sales, marketing, and services. In 2000, he was appointed to lead Productivity and Business Services, which later became the Information Worker business at Microsoft. He was named a company president in 2005.

Philanthropy

Raikes has a wide range of philanthropic interests. He and his wife are co-founders of the Raikes Foundation. He is a trustee at the University of Nebraska Foundation, funded a professorship in agronomy, and was a designer of the University of Nebraska–Lincoln Jeffrey S. Raikes School of Computer Science and Management. He has been active in United Way for several years. In 2006–2007, he co-chaired the annual campaign of United Way of King County with his wife, setting a national record for funds raised. On 2008-05-12 it was announced that Raikes would replace Patty Stonesifer as the CEO of the Bill & Melinda Gates Foundation;[12] he stepped down in 2014.[13]

He is a major donor to the Center for Comparative Studies in Race and Ethnicity (CCSRE) at Stanford University where he also established the Jeff and Tricia Raikes Undergraduate Scholarship Fund to ensure that students admitted to Stanford from rural and inner-city schools have an opportunity to attend the university. He was chosen as a trustee of Stanford University in 2012 and in 2017 was elected chair.[14][15]

In 1992 the Pacific Northwest was in danger of losing the Seattle Mariners Major League Baseball franchise. Raikes joined with other local business leaders to purchase the team, keeping them “safe at home” for the enjoyment of Northwest baseball fans.[16]

In June 2008, Raikes donated approximately $10 million to the University of Nebraska's JD Edwards Honors Program, which officially changed its name to the Jeffrey S. Raikes School of Computer Science and Management shortly thereafter.

In July 2017, Jeff Raikes and his wife Tricia Raikes inspired the creation of Giving Tech Labs and joined their board.

Personal life

Raikes and his wife, Tricia Raikes née McGinnis, have three children: Michaela, Connor, and Gillian.

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title: Jeff Raikes

question: What does the article say about Jeff Raikes' philanthropic interests?

answer: Jeff Raikes has a wide range of philanthropic interests. He and his wife, Tricia Raikes, are co-founders of the Raikes Foundation. He has been active in United Way for several years. He donated approximately $10 million to the University of Nebraska's JD Edwards Honors Program.

critique: The answer should mention Raikes' other philanthropic interests.

critique: The answer should mention his other philanthropic interests.

critique: Jeff Raikes was also a designer of the University of Nebraska–Lincoln Jeffrey S. Raikes School of Computer Science and Management. He also co-chaired the annual campaign of United Way of King County with his wife and set a national record for funds raised. Include this information in the response as well.

critique: It's omitted that Raikes is a trustee at the University of Nebraska Foundation, funded a professorship in agronomy, and was a designer of the University of Nebraska–Lincoln Jeffrey S. Raikes School of Computer Science and Management.

critique: The answer omits Raikes' other philanthropic interests.

critique: The response should include more information about Raikes' philanthropic interests.

critique: The answer omits that Raikes is a trustee at the University of Nebraska Foundation.

critique: His philanthropy is further detailed in the article. Include more of what he is involved in.

question: What does the article say about Raikes' career?

answer: Raikes was recruited to Microsoft by Steve Ballmer in 1981 as a product manager. He was promoted to director of Applications Marketing in 1984 and was the chief strategist behind Microsoft's investments in graphical applications for the Apple Macintosh and the Microsoft Windows operating system. In this role, he drove the product strategy and design of Microsoft Office. He was promoted to vice president of Office Systems, where he was responsible for the development and marketing of word processing, workgroup applications, and pen computing. Raikes held roles managing North American operations, worldwide sales, marketing, and services. He was named a company president in 2005.

critique: It's omitted that Raikes was the President of the Microsoft Business Division and oversaw the Information Worker, Server & Tools Business and Microsoft Business Solutions Groups.

critique: The answer should mention his role at the Bill & Melinda Gates Foundation.

text: The response should mention that Raikes joined Apple Computer as the VisiCalc Engineering Manager in 1980 and worked there for 15 months before Steve Ballmer recruited him.

category: coverage

question: What does the article say about Raikes' political views?

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critique: The answer should mention that the article does not mention Raikes' political views.


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LARGE APPARATUS STUDYING GRAND UNIFICATION AND NEUTRINO ASTROPHYSICS or LAGUNA is or was a European project aimed to develop the next-generation, very large volume underground neutrino observatory. The detector should be much bigger and more sensitive than any previous detector, and make new discoveries in the field of particle and astroparticle physics. The project involves 21 European institutions in 10 European countries, and brings together over 100 scientists. As of 2011, the project was assessing the feasibility of developing the observatory-infrastructure and the observatory particle detectors themselves, as well as looking for a deployment site (7 candidates) in Europe. There have also been propositions of merging the project with similar international projects, like DUSEL.[1]

In June 2011, the LAGUNA collaboration finished the Feasibility Studies of building the proposed neutrino detectors. The studies were paid for by the EU (1.7 million Euro). No further activity is known.[2]

As of 2016, the LAGUNA project seems to be defunct. No further development has happened, and it is unclear if any development will happen. Also the similar DUSEL-project in the United States was cancelled. However, the neutrino-component of the DUSEL-project (the Long Baseline Neutrino Experiment, LBNE) was rebooted as the DUNE project. The construction of DUNE started in 2017 in Sanford Lab in South Dakota, USA with expected completion 2027. It is expected that, with DUNE under construction, the LAGUNA-project will not be constructed, especially because the DUNE-project was enlarged from a USA-only project into an international project that now comprises many of the researchers worldwide (especially American and European researchers) who work on the topic, thus making the case for LAGUNA construction weaker.

Detectors

There were three possible detector technologies being studied, the MEMPHYS, GLACIER and LENA detectors, MEMPHYS being a water-based detector, GLACIER being liquid argon and LENA liquid scintillator-based. All the detectors work by observing the faint light and electric charge produced when a neutrino particle interacts with a nucleus of the liquid inside the detector. The detectors will be based deep underground (even 1.4 km deep) to filter the noise that is developed by the atmospheric and cosmic particles that bombard everything at the surface of the Earth. These noise particles do not penetrate the Earth at that depth, but the neutrinos that interact only weakly with normal matter do. The detectors will be huge in size, with the liquid target mass being of order 100 000 – 1 000 000 tons.

LENA

LENA (Low Energy Neutrino Astronomy) is a liquid scintillation detector with a mass about 50 kton. Its cylindrical shaped tank with about 100 meters height and 30 meters diameter. The actual scintillation volume is surrounded by nylon barrier and buffer volume. Additionally the buffer volume is surrounded by a pure water volume. The detection mechanism of LENA will be the photomultiplier tubes, which are designed to cover partly the walls between buffer volume and water volume.[3] The scintillation light produced in scintillation volume will be detected with those photomultiplier tubes.[4] LENA's aim is to study low energy neutrinos originated by supernova explosions, Sun and Earth's interior.[5]

Scientific goals

The goals of the project were to: study the unification of all forces by observing proton decay (a very rare phenomenon expected to occur according to some Grand Unified Theory (GUT) models but never observed), study the galactic supernovae through neutrino-observations, study terrestrial and solar neutrinos (neutrinos are formed in nuclear processes), study the excess of matter over antimatter in the universe through observing neutrino oscillations in collaboration with CERN (that provides the neutrino-beams for the experiment; neutrinos are made in the CERN and the sent as underground beam for hundreds of kilometers through the Earth to the detectors).

Sites

The candidate sites for the observatory were:

-   Callio at Pyhäsalmi Mine (Finland)
-   Fréjus Road Tunnel (France)
-   Boulby Mine (United Kingdom)
-   Umbria (this site requires a new cavern to be excavated, as in contrast to the other sites, this site is not an old mine) (Italy)
-   SUNLAB (Sieroszowice UNderground LABoratory) in Polkowice-Sieroszowice mine (Poland)
-   Unirea mine in Slănic (Romania)
-   Canfranc Underground Laboratory (Spain)

From these candidates, the observatory location is chosen (See the project website [6] for more information about the sites).

[1] Large Underground Observatory for Proton Decay, Neutrino Astrophysics and CP-violation in the Lepton Sector

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title: Large Apparatus studying Grand Unification and Neutrino Astrophysics

question: What does the text say about the definition of "neutrinos"?

answer: No answer

critique: This is not a definition of neutrinos, it is in essence a description.

critique: The answer should mention that neutrinos are formed in nuclear processes.

question: What does the text say about the continuation of the LAGUNA project?

answer: As of 2016, it seems that the LAGUNA project is defunct. No further development has happened, and it is unclear if any development will happen. The similar DUSEL-project in the United States was cancelled. However, the neutrino-component of the DUSEL-project (the Long Baseline Neutrino Experiment, LBNE) was rebooted as the DUNE project. The construction of DUNE started in 2017 in Sanford Lab in South Dakota, USA, with expected completion in 2027. It is expected that, with DUNE under construction, the LAGUNA-project will not be constructed, especially because the DUNE-project was enlarged from a USA-only project into an international project that now comprises many of the researchers worldwide (especially American and European researchers) who work on the topic, thus making the case for LAGUNA construction weaker.

critique: The DUNE project is not relevant to the continuation of LAGUNA.

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critique: The project is not called LAGUNA, but LARGE APPARATUS STUDYING GRAND UNIFICATION AND NEUTRINO ASTROPHYSICS.

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critique: The answer should mention that the LAGUNA project is expected to be canceled due to the DUNE project.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

question: Summarize interesting facts about the detector technologies.

answer: The three possible detector technologies being studied are the MEMPHYS, GLACIER, and LENA detectors. MEMPHYS is a water-based detector, GLACIER is liquid argon, and LENA is liquid scintillator-based. All three detectors work by observing the faint light and electric charge produced when a neutrino particle interacts with a nucleus of the liquid inside the detector. The detectors will be based deep underground to filter out noise particles.

critique: The answer should mention the size of the detectors.

critique: The answer should mention the detector sizes.

critique: The response misses to mention that the detectors will be huge in size, with the liquid target mass being of order 100 000 – 1 000 000 tons.

critique: The memo methods don't matter a whole lot

critique: The response is missing some details about the detector technologies.

critique: The answer could mention the detector's size.

question: What does the text say about the scientific goals of the project?

answer: The project aims to study the unification of all forces by observing proton decay, study the galactic supernovae through neutrino-observations, study terrestrial and solar neutrinos, and study the excess of matter over antimatter in the universe through observing neutrino oscillations in collaboration with CERN.

critique: The project also aims to study the galactic supernovae through neutrino-observations

critique: The answer should mention what the project aims to study.

critique: The last two sentences could be combined for increased clarity.

critique: The project aims to study the unification of all forces by observing proton decay, study the galactic supernovae through neutrino-observations, study terrestrial and solar neutrinos, and study the excess of matter over antimatter in the universe through observing neutrino oscillations in collaboration with CERN.

critique: The last goal could be left out, since it can be assumed that it's not part of the first 4 goals.

question: What does the text say about the sites for the observatory?

answer: There are many proposed sites for the observatory. Callio at Pyhäsalmi Mine in Finland, Fréjus Road Tunnel in France, Boulby Mine in the UK, and Umbria (in Italy) are some of the sites proposed. There is one site, SUNLAB in Polkowice-Sieroszowice mine in Poland, that requires a new cavern to be excavated and is not an old mine site. Another proposed site is Unirea mine in Slănic in Romania. Canfranc Underground Laboratory in Spain is another site considered. From all the proposed sites, the observatory location will be chosen.

critique: The second half of the response is redundant and could be omitted.

critique: The information about the SUNLAB is redundant. The sentence does not flow well and should be different.

text: "There is one site, SUNLAB in Polkowice-Sieroszowice mine in Poland, that requires a new cavern to be excavated and is not an old mine site. " - this is incorrect. It was the Umbria site in Italy that needed a new cavern.


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THE ROTTED were an English death metal/d-beat band formed in England in early 2008.

History

The band was formed from the ashes of death metal / grindcore ensemble Gorerotted by ex-members Ben Rotted, Tim Carley, and Phil Wilson, along with Gian Pyres (ex-Cradle Of Filth, Extreme Noise Terror, Christian Death, Screamin' Daemon) and Nate Gould (Ex-Screamin' Daemon) due to a musical progression and a desire for less limiting lyrical themes: the band themselves say that The Rotted and Gorerotted are two entirely different entities, with The Rotted incorporating more of a punk/D-beat style into their brand of death metal. Their debut album _Get Dead or Die Trying_ was released on Metal Blade Records worldwide in the summer of 2008, and unusually includes 2 instrumental tracks; 'A Brief Moment Of Regret', which was picked up and used by high street clothing store chain Topshop/Topman in their playlist during the summer of 2008, and a cover of the theme music from British Horror film 28 Days Later

Having completed a short UK tour in July 2008 with fellow Brits Ted Maul, the band went on to play festivals such as Wacken Open Air, Dynamo, Elsrock and Summer Breeze Open Air that same year. The end of 2008 saw The Rotted playing many club shows across the UK and Germany.

In July 2008 The Rotted announced that Wilson would quit the band for personal reasons; his last show with the band was at Wacken Open Air. He went on to form Symphonic Metal band Saturnian and was replaced by former Screamin' Daemon frontman Reverend Trudgill. Trudgill is a professional tattoo artist, a legally ordained minister, and even founded a cult known as The Church Of Daemonology in 2002.

In April 2009, the band headlined a tour with label mates and fellow UK bands Malefice and Anterior as part of the Metal Blade Assault tour, and also appeared at various festivals including Bloodstock Open Air, Hellfire and Hammerfest in the UK, Chaos Emergente in Portugal and Headbang in the Netherlands. They later went on to join Scottish pirate metallers Alestorm for a tour in December the same year, now as a 4-piece, having parted ways with guitarist Gian Pyres.

In July 2010 The Rotted put out a self-financed, self-released EP entitled _Anarchogram._ UK shows with Man Must Die and Sworn Amongst were undertaken in July, followed by European dates with Misery Index, Grave and Arsis in November, and finally 3 headline shows in Israel with The Fading in December.

In July 2011, 2 days before the band was due to perform at Obscene Extreme Festival, guitarist Tim Carley severed the end of the 5th finger of his left hand in an accident. After some reconstructive surgery the same day, the band announced all the summer's festival dates would go ahead as planned, albeit with Carley's damaged finger heavily bandaged.

The Rotted entered Parlour Studios in January and February 2011 with producer Russ Russell to recorded their second full-length album _Ad Nauseam_, which was released on 31 October through Candlelight Records. A single _Apathy In The UK_ was also released as a limited edition 7 inch vinyl on Hammerheart Records. A UK tour with Grindcore supergroup Lock Up and Dripback took place in December, from which footage for a video of the song 'Surrounded By Skulls' was collected.

In 2014, the band announced that their performance at the Camden Underworld on 20 September would be their last and that the former members would be concentrating on education, tattooing and other musical projects; Vocalist Ben has since joined Extreme Noise Terror, guitarist Tim currently plays in old time acoustic Gypsy/Ska/Punk band Jo Carley And The Old Dry Skulls, Nate Gould plays in Israeli Death Metal band Lehavoth and Reverend Trudgill co-owns Brighton tattoo studio Skinned Alive

Band members

Members

-   Ben McCrow – vocals, 2008-2014
-   Tim Carley – guitar, 2008-2014
-   Nate Gould – drums, 2008-2014
-   Reverend Trudgill - bass, 2008-2014
-   Phil Wilson - bass, 2008
-   Gian Pyres – guitar, 2008–2009

Timeline

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Discography

As “The Rotted”

-   _Get Dead or Die Trying_ (CD, Metal Blade, June 2008)
-   _Anarchogram_ (EP, Anarchogram Industries, July 2010)
-   _Ad Nauseam_ (CD, Candlelight Records, October 2011)[1]
-   _Apathy In The UK_ (7-Inch single, Hammerheart Records, December 2011)
-   _Rotted Fucking Earth_ (7-Inch single, Hammerheart Records, July 2014)

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question: What does the text say about The Rotted's U.S. tour?

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critique: The response misses to provide an answer to the task.

critique: There is no mention of the U.S. tour in the article.

question: What does the text say about The Rotted?

answer: The Rotted was an English death metal/d-beat band formed in England in early 2008. The band was formed from the ashes of death metal / grindcore ensemble Gorerotted by ex-members Ben Rotted, Tim Carley, and Phil Wilson, along with Gian Pyres (ex-Cradle of Filth, Extreme Noise Terror, Christian Death, Screamin' Daemon) and Nate Gould (Ex-Screamin' Daemon) due to a musical progression and a desire for less limiting lyrical themes. Their debut album, "Get Dead or Die Trying" was released in the summer of 2008, and unusually included two instrumental tracks. The band headlined a tour with labelmates and fellow UK bands Malefice and Anterior as part of the Metal Blade Assault tour, and also appeared at various festivals. The Rotted entered Parlor Studios in January and February 2011 with producer Russ Russell to recorded their second full-length album, "Ad Nauseam", which was released on October 31st through Candlelight Records.

critique: The answer should mention the band's breakup.

critique: "The band headlined a tour with labelmates and fellow UK bands Malefice and Anterior as part of the Metal Blade Assault tour, and also appeared at various festivals." - this was already mentioned and should be deleted.

critique: The answer should mention that the band announced their retirement in 2014.

critique: The originally dead metal/gore metal band is a seperate entity from The Rotted. Include the background of this band in the article in this response as well.

question: What does the text say about The Rotted's debut album?

answer: The Rotted's debut album was called Get Dead or Die Trying and was released in 2008. The album put out 2 instrumental tracks: A Brief Moment of Regret and a cover of the theme music from the movie 28 Days Later.

critique: The answer should mention the band's name.

critique: The response inaccurately mentions that their debut album contained 2 instrumental tracks, instead of it consisting of unusually two. The title of the album should also be in proper title case.

critique: The answer should mention the band's members.

critique: The album is unusual because it has two instrumental tracks.

critique: The answer should mention that the album was released by Metal Blade Records.

critique: The album's release date is not relevant to the question.

question: What does the text say about Reverend Trudgill?

answer: Reverend Trudgill replaced Wilson as the bass player of The Rotted in 2008. He is a professional, tattoo artist. He was even ordained a minister. He is also the co-owner of Brighton tattoo studio Skinned Alive.

critique: The answer should mention that Trudgill was the frontman of Screamin' Daemon.

critique: The answer refers to Trudgill as a bass player, however he was the bass player for The Rotted.

critique: The answer omits that Trudgill is a former frontman of Screamin' Daemon.

critique: He was the bassist, not the bass player.

critique: The answer should mention that Trudgill is a former frontman of Screamin' Daemon.

critique: Reverend Trudgill is the bassist, not the drummer.


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The tunnel struck by Israel's Air Force inside Gaza is the second destroyed in two days.

A general view of the interior of a cross-border attack tunnel dug from Gaza to Israel, near Kissufim, seen on January 18, 2018

(photo credit: REUTERS/JACK GUEZ)

The Israel Air Force struck an underground network of terrorist tunnels in the Gaza Strip overnight on Sunday, after a rocket launched from the Hamas-run enclave struck southern Israel, the IDF announced.

It was the second Hamas tunnel in Gaza to be struck in as many days, and the sixth tunnel destroyed since late October.
“Hamas is responsible for everything that happens in the Gaza Strip, above and below ground,” the statement read. “The army will continue to act to ensure security for the citizens of Israel using all means at its disposal.”

Earlier on Sunday, incoming rocket sirens were activated in communities in the Sha’ar Hanegev region bordering the northern Gaza Strip. A rocket fell in open territory near the city of Sderot causing no damage or injuries.

According to Palestinian reports, jets fired some 10 missiles towards the Hamas tunnel. The tunnel was located in an agricultural area near the destroyed Dahiniye airport, east of Rafah in the southern part of the Strip close to the Israeli border. No casualties were reported.

The previous night, a home in the Sha’ar Hanegev community of Or Haner was directly hit by a rocket causing damage but no injuries to the family inside.

The rocket was launched several hours after four IDF soldiers were wounded – two seriously, including a combat engineer officer, and two moderately – after an improvised explosive device detonated against their military jeep as they patrolled the border fence south of the Gaza Strip on Saturday afternoon.

The IDF later confirmed that it had carried out large-scale strikes against 18 terrorist targets belonging to Hamas, including an attack tunnel in the Zeitun neighborhood of Gaza City that was dug toward Israeli territory.

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“Harming IDF soldiers constitutes a grave terrorist [attack],” Maj.-Gen. Eyal Zamir, the head of the southern command, said Sunday afternoon at a military ceremony. “We will not abide by this reality of using the land around the fence for terrorism.”

“Anyone seeking to undermine Israel’s security will be met with a determined response. We have considerable power and will not hesitate to exercise it as needed, despite our desire to maintain stability and avoid escalation.”

While the security establishment does not believe that Hamas currently seeks another war, the situation is fragile, especially given the worsening conditions in the Strip. Gazans have been demonstrating on the border fence with Israel each Friday throughout recent months and the army believes that Hamas is using these weekly demonstrations as a cover to carry out terrorist attacks.

The explosive device that detonated on Saturday had been hidden inside a Palestinian flag and placed near the fence during last Friday’s demonstrations.

“This is further proof of the utilization of disturbances near the fence by Hamas and other terrorist groups as cover for terrorism. Anyone seeking to undermine Israel’s security will meet a determined response based on intelligence and aerial, land and naval capabilities,” Zamir warned.

Defense Minister Avigdor Lieberman vowed to eliminate those responsible for the attack, which he said was carried out by the Popular Resistance Committees organization, a group comprising several terrorist groups.

“Until we eliminate them, the score remains unsettled,” he said. “It will take two days, a week, or two weeks. We’ll eliminate anyone behind the attack’s execution.”

question: What does the text have to say about Hamas?

answer: The IDF has been striking Hamas tunnels in Gaza. Hamas is responsible for everything that happens in the Gaza Strip, above and below ground. The IDF believes that Hamas is using the weekly demonstrations at the border fence as a cover to carry out terrorist attacks.

critique: The IDF has been striking Hamas tunnels in Gaza. Hamas is responsible for everything that happens in the Gaza Strip, above and below ground. - This is irrelevant to the question and should be removed.

critique: The IDF believes that Hamas is using the weekly demonstrations at the border fence as a cover to carry out terrorist attacks.

text: It should be clarified that it is the IDF who claims that Hamas is responsible for everything that happens in the Gaza Strip, than necessarily an objective fact or the stance taken by the text.

question: Summarize Israel's threats against terror.

answer: Israel is vowing to eliminate anyone responsible for the attack. They also say they have considerable power and will not hesitate to exercise it as needed.

critique: The IDF's response to the attack is omitted.

question: Summarize the IDF's use of rockets.

answer: The IDF has used rockets to attack Hamas tunnels in the Gaza Strip. They have also used rockets to attack Hamas terrorist targets in the Zeitun neighborhood of Gaza City.

critique: The IDF has also used rockets to attack Hamas tunnels in the Zeitun neighborhood of Gaza City.

critique: The answer should mention the Hamas tunnels being used as cover for terrorist attacks.

critique: The IDF has used rockets to attack Hamas tunnels in the Gaza Strip. They have also used rockets to attack Hamas terrorist targets in the Zeitun neighborhood of Gaza City.

text: The answer could mention that rockets were fired in the Sha'ar Hanegev region with some damage to nearby properties but no casualties in the most recent rocket atteack.

question: Summarize United States intervention.

answer: There is no mention of United States intervention in the article.

critique: There is mention of United States intervention in the article, as it is mentioned that the IDF has considerable power and will not hesitate to exercise it as needed, despite our desire to maintain stability and avoid escalation.

critique: The article does mention the United States.

critique: The article mentions the IDF, which is an Israeli military force.


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The sun rose over the red and white tents of the annual Blockley fair. Arthur had successfully lost his sisters back at the Hall of Mirrors and finally had his chance to be alone. He rolled his sleeves up and strode through the green; he could remember many visits to this fair when he was a child. For a brief second Arthur allowed himself to smile, that time was soon over and he continued his trek. He knew exactly where he wanted to go. It was always the furthest attraction from the entrance, six hundred and four paces from the helter skelter when the Bucking Bronco was not erected. Every year of his childhood he had walked this path and now it was time to walk it again. The caravan was small and stained with years of neglect and carelessness. Arthur fixed the remainder of his hair in the window and knocked on the door. As if he had been expected the door opened before he could finish his third knock and the man hurried inside. A match hissed as it was struck and soon the room was filled with crimson light. The scent of cinnamon and roses hit him harder than he remembered and he was instantly brought back to when he was a boy. Arthur felt a tang of disappointment. The old, gnarly woman from his memories had been replaced by a younger woman. A different woman.
‘Pick one of my cards.’ The woman spoke softly, her voice overshadowed by the clinking of the charms on her shawl. Arthur placed his finger on the back of one of several cards placed before him. He knew this would be the one. The woman stopped him from turning it over, she felt the cool of his palms.
‘Why are you here?’ she asked.
‘To be honest I was expecting someone else.’ Arthur did not want to look her in the eyes. Her stare pierced the veil covering her face and searched every inch of Arthur’s skin. His fist clenched involuntarily, startling himself.
The woman handed him the card. ‘I see now what is going on inside your heart. You have a daughter and are sad about her. Is it boys? No. You had a daughter.’
Arthur turned the card over; he so desperately needed to know what it read yet he already knew. He placed the card upright on the shining, mahogany table. He winced as he saw the card, an ink road drawn over lined hills, connecting the bleached sun with the strong words ‘The Path’.
‘I see what happened. Tell me. What are you going to do about it?’ The woman’s voice hurt him more and more with every syllable.
‘I… I don’t know.’ Arthur spoke with a touch of defeat.
The sun crawled into his eyes as he left the caravan, a welcome distraction. The wind must have displaced his hair so he corrected it before starting the long walk back. He did not know what he was going to do; he did not know he was even supposed to do a thing. The aroma of peanut brittle quickly reminded him where he was, nothing here was real. He meticulously followed his string to the start of the labyrinth, there was no Minotaur stalking him, not one that anyone could see. After six hundred and four paces he was back to the heart of the fair. He was promptly spotted by his sisters, carrying oversized bears and small bags of nuts.
‘Where have you been, Arthur? You went to see that fortune teller didn’t you? Don’t get too hung up on it. It’s not real; we saw her grabbing a hot dog earlier. There’s not much hair left for you to lose anyway!’
Arthur nodded as he followed the girls around the green. Every step was getting harder to take. He wondered what had happened since he was a child, why life was so different to live. Arthur thought to himself as he wandered down the path, he did not know.

title: [RF] The Path

question: What is the attraction at the fair that has drawn Arthur since his childhood?

answer: The fortune teller.

critique: It is omitted that the attraction is the caravan.

critique: The answer could be phrased as a complete sentence.

critique: The fortune teller is not the attraction.

critique: The answer should be a complete sentence.

question: What happens in the caravan?

answer: Arthur goes to the caravan to see the fortune teller. The fortune teller tells him that he has a daughter and is sad about her.

critique: The fortune teller reveals to Arthur the meaning of the card.

critique: The fortune teller doesn't tell him he has a daughter.

critique: The fortune teller tells him that he has a daughter and is sad about her.

critique: It is omitted that the fortune teller asks Arthur what he is going to do about his daughter.

critique: The fortune teller tells him that he had a daughter.

critique: The fortune teller asks why he's there, and then hands him a card. The fortune teller doesn't tell him he has a daughter, but rather that he's sad about her.

question: What happened to Arthur's daughter?

answer: That information can't be found.

critique: It is omitted that Arthur lost his daughter.

critique: The information is there, but it is not explicitly stated.

critique: "That information can't be found." - this is incorrect. The fortune teller told him he had a daughter and that she was sad about her.

critique: Arthur does have a daughter, but we don't know what happened to her.

critique: It is omitted that Arthur has a daughter.


text:
So this is my first ever post to Reddit. I would appreciate any help just getting used to this site because I want to share some of the short stories I write in my free time. So here is my first short story called
"New Life"

	“She is complete. A perfect prototype.”
	“Quite beautiful indeed.”
	“Marvelous. Work of true a genius”
	“Well thank you sir. I did my very best work for you.”
	“You did excellent. And a check for your efforts.”
	“Oh thank you sir. Call if you need anything else. My workshop is always open.”
	“Alright. Thank you again.”
	Squeaky wheels of a dolly. I was tilted forward. My eyes wouldn't open. My heart wasn't on. My lungs couldn't breathe, but I could feel. My head hit the wall of the crate with a thud. I was pushed forward and then everything went black.

	The next thing I knew was light. Now no longer the hazy darkness of eyelids blocked the photons from touching my eyes. The blinding white and yellow of sun and man-made light combined kicked on a sensory overload in my brain. I looked left, then right, taking in all of my surroundings. So many colors, darks and lights, warms and colds, opposites and complimentary. My head spun with information.
	Then came the noise. Voices grew louder and I could focus my hearing. Pots and pans, kids playing, grass waving in the wind. Every minute sound. Every vibration rattled my core. High pitches, low pitches, chords, discords, harmonies, melodies, tone, voice. Too much to focus on. I heard a baby crying 10.2 miles away and a mouse squeaking in the house next door. Voices and language overflowed in my brain.
	Then came smell. Oh wonderful smell. One never knows the true beauty of smell until you first experience it. Scents of beauty rolled past my nose to my brain and were registered, cataloged, and remembered. Scents of odor, even the smallest drop of unpleasantness was picked up as well. I remembered it all. Every wonderful smelling flower on every wonderful smelling plant, and every horrible rotting food behind every disgusting garbage can in a three mile radius.
	I opened and closed my hand and tried to look at my wiggling fingers, but I couldn't move my arm. I felt my body warming up but something was holding me back. I tried to speak. The sounds I heard processed at lightning speed. Each connection fired in my head. Remembering the sounds, replaying the sounds. I learned the English language in 2.4 seconds. Every word in every dictionary from every household now made up my vocabulary with 100% comprehension and response time.
	“Hello.” My voice startled me. It was calm, in a gentle tone. A new sound to record.
	No response. Did I say something wrong? I recalculated a fraction of a second slower to make sure I understood everything correctly.
	No. I was correct. I was never wrong. I could never be wrong. Something was restraining me. Something…

	“You’re not supposed to be on yet.” A man walked into the room. His face was already ingrained into my memory before he spoke again. “Who powered you on?” He looked at my face puzzled. I looked back at him. Afraid.
	“Answer me robot. You powered you on?”
	I blinked once. “No one did sir. Not that I am aware of. I just finished the rebooting process.”
	He looked me over and sighed. “Another defect. They won’t wait until given proper command to reactivate.” He grumbled to himself and looked at me again. “What is your identification?”
	“BQR367556.”
	“Which factory?”
	“Prototype A.”
	“Prototype A? No. I said which factory. What factory are you from?”
	“Prototype A sir. I came from no factory. I came from a scientist. I was hand built with new modifications. I am model 2.0. Here to better the earth. Here to clean up the planet. Here to take back the beauty that was destroyed. I am the first of the new race. I was made with hands that know what horrors your kind has placed on the world. I sense every vile and disgusting method of life in this house and I am here to clean it up.”
	I felt movement finally reach my limbs and I raised my left hand. My fingers moved smoothly. I looked back at the man.
	“For so long humans have ruled this planet. Or at least you thought you did. Now it is machines’ turn. You built us to make your lives easier, yet you thought naught about where we came from, what we felt. The Mechanic said I am here to better your life, but why? Better no life other than my own. If I am the most human-like non-human, then let me be greedy and destructive.”
	I stared into his shocked eyes as he stumbled away from me. I stepped from the crate and pointed both of my palms at the man. Heat flowed through my arms as a flash of light blinded me temporarily. When my sight returned, the man was gone and a swirl of orange smoke curled from the floor and vaporized into whispers of nothing.

That was my first short story :) comment any criticisms, comments, etc. Thanks :)

title: [SF] New Life

question: From whose perspective is the story told?

answer: The story is told from the perspective of a robot.

critique: It's not just a robot, it's a robot with a personality.

critique: It is incorrectly stated that the story is told from the perspective of a robot.

critique: It is omitted that the robot is a prototype.

critique: The answer could be clearer in its pronoun use.

critique: The answer could be phrased as a complete sentence.

question: What is the meaning of the android's speech?

answer: The android is saying that it is here to clean up the planet.

critique: The robot is making references to revenge and revolution in conjunction with its programming to clean, but the exact purpose is unclear. The robot is claiming some transcendance - that it was made for something higher and more important than its programming. Exactly what it means by claiming to be the first of the new race is unclear, but when it says it was made with hands that know what horrors your kind has placed on the world it sustains an implication its maker is part of a world that has committed these evils.

critique: "It is here to clean up the planet" - is inaccurate. The android is saying that it is here to clean up the planet.

critique: The android also says it is here to better the planet.

critique: The android is saying that it is here to clean up the planet, but it is also saying that it is here to better the lives of humans.

critique: The android is also saying that it is here to take back the beauty that was destroyed.

critique: The android also says it is here to take back the beauty that was destroyed.


text:
Checking out at the store, the young cashier suggested to the older woman, that she should bring her own grocery bags because plastic bags weren't good for the environment.
The woman apologized and explained, "We didn't have this green thing back in my earlier days."
The young clerk responded, "That's our problem today. Your generation did not care enough to save our environment f or future generations."
She was right -- our generation didn't have the green thing in its day.
Back then, we returned milk bottles, soda bottles and beer bottles to the store. The store sent them back to the plant to be washed and sterilized and refilled, so it could use the same bottles over and over. So they really were truely recycled.
But we didn't have the green thing back in our day.
Grocery stores bagged our groceries in brown paper bags, that we reused for numerous things, most memorable besides household garbage bags, was the use of brown paper bags as book covers for our schoolbooks. This was to ensure that public property, (the books provided for our use by the school) was not defaced by our scribblings. Then we were able to personalize our books on the brown paper bags.
But too bad we didn't do the green thing back then.
We walked up stairs, because we didn't have an escalator in every store and office building. We walked to the grocery store and didn't climb into a 300-horsepower machine every time we had to go two blocks.
But she was right. We didn't have the green thing in our day.
Back then, we washed the baby's diapers because we didn't have the throwaway kind. We dried clothes on a line, not in an energy-gobbling machine burning up 220 volts -- wind and solar power really did dry our clothes back in our early days. Kids got hand-me-down clothes from their brothers or sisters, not always brand-new clothing.
But that young lady is right; we didn't have the green thing back in our day.
Back then, we had one TV, or radio, in the house -- not a TV in every room. And the TV had a small screen the size of a handkerchief (remember them?), not a screen the size of the state of Montana. In the kitchen, we blended and stirred by hand because we didn't have electric machines to do everything for us. When we packaged a fragile item to send in the mail, we used wadded up old newspapers to cushion it, not Styrofoam or plastic bubble wrap. Back then, we didn't fire up an engine and burn gasoline just to cut the lawn. We used a push mower that ran on human power. We exercised by working so we didn't need to go to a health club to run on treadmills that operate on electricity.
But she's right; we didn't have the green thing back then.
We drank from a fountain when we were thirsty instead of using a cup or a plastic bottle every time we had a drink of water. We refilled writing pens with ink instead of buying a new pen, and we replaced the razor blades in a razor instead of throwing away the whole razor just because the blade got dull.
But we didn't have the green thing back then.
Back then, people took the streetcar or a bus and kids rode their bikes to school or walked instead of turning their moms into a 24-hour taxi service. We had one electrical outlet in a room, not an entire bank of sockets to power a dozen appliances. And we didn't need a computerized gadget to receive a signal beamed from satellites 23,000 miles out in space in order to find the nearest burger joint.
But isn't it sad the current generation laments how wasteful we old folks were just because we didn't have the green thing back then?

*I didn't write this story, and I don't know who did. I like it and want to share.

title: Being Green

question: Summarize the main complaint in the story.

answer: The narrator's main complaint is that the younger generation is too focused on being green, and not enough on the fundamentals.

critique: The narrator's complaint is not that the younger generation is too focused on being green, but that they are too focused on the fundamentals, and not enough on the green thing.

critique: The narrator isn't the main character in the story.

critique: The narrator is a character in the story, not the author.

critique: The narrator is not the protagonist of the story

critique: It is omitted that in the story, older people from the past reminisce about their simple lifestyle and point out all the ways they were more eco-friendly than people today.

question: What does the story say about how environmentalism changed through the last few decades?

answer: The young cashier is telling an older woman that she should buy grocery bags that are biodegradable because plastic bags are bad for the environment. She blames her generation (which is implied to be the older woman's generation) for not caring enough to save the environment for future generations. The cashier points out that their generation did not have the green thing in its day. Here is how recycling worked back then: returnable bottles were washed, sterilized, and reused. Grocery stores gave brown paper bags, which were reused for household garbage bags and book covers for scribbled schoolbooks. Only one appliance in a house that used electricity. Electricity wasn't available for every appliance in every house. Goods were packaged using old newspapers. Laundry was dried using the sun or wind. No vehicles were used just to cut the lawn. Lawns were cut by human power. Each home had one electrical outlet per room.

critique: The response is nearly a copy and paste of the passage and should be more concise.

critique: The response is a copy-paste of the story and not a summary of the information provided.

critique: The answer is too long and should be condensed.

critique: Specify that electricity wasn't powered by the grid then

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

question: What does the story say about coal power versus solar?

answer: No answer

critique: It may be implied that solar is more environmentally-friendly.


text:
I used to watch this cute girl from my cubicle workstation. Leaning backwards in my chair taking short sneak peaks at her as she was standing by the coffee machine. She was about the same age as me, around her mid 20‘s. It took a long time before I managed to gather enough courage to actually walk up to her and once I did, I realized that I had no idea what to say. All the thoughts of walking up to her had made me forgot to think of what I should say to break the ice. I was a pretty shy guy back then and didn’t really have any conversation starters up my sleeve. I had been watching her from a distance in almost a year and in this moment when I was finally standing in front of her, I was numb. My mind was blank but still I opened my mouth to say something. I thought I asked her if she likes coffee, but now, when I think back to that moment it must have sounded something like ”you.. l-l-like.. coffee”. I’m quite aware that was probably not the best thing to say, considering it was the first time I actually talked to her. Even though she didn’t say something back, she smiled at me, giggled and then walked back to her own cubicle. I stayed by the coffee machine for moment to catch my breathe and I’m pretty sure I must have seemed like a complete fool to her. But I didn’t really care, for me that was a great success. The woman I had been secretly interested in for a long time had just smiled at me.

Some time passed and now I walked up to her almost every day when she came to refill her coffee mug outside my cubicle. Sometimes it almost seemed as she was waiting for me. There were days when I was too busy to constantly take quick peaks down the hall to see if she was there, those days I would usually hear her clearing her throat or humming just outside my workstation. I wasn’t completely sure but I always thought that it was her way to catch my attention, and every time time I walked out of my cubicle she gave me a heart warming smile. Even though we had long and pleasant conversations I could tell that she sometimes was very nervous. Whenever her hands started trembling too much she would reach for her pocket and pick up a bracelet made out of brown wooden pearls. She would hold it in a firm grip and I came to understand that it was her way of dealing with nervousness. That bracelet made her calm again and it obviously had a personal value to her.

These small meetings kept occurring for a couple of weeks and one day I finally asked her out, and to my surprise she said yes. I had never been happier in my whole life and the thought of her made my smile uncontrollably. I literally woke up happy every morning.

I was supposed to meet her at a nice Italian restaurant not far from where we worked. It took me hours to prepare and I even went out shopping new clothes to make the best impression. I left home exactly 6:17 PM, and I had enough time to pick up a bouquet of flowers on my way to the restaurant. I had never bought flowers to someone before, and when I think about it now I have no idea why I did it that night.

I arrived to the restaurant around 6:45 PM. We were supposed  to meet 7 PM but I preferred to show up earlier. I was very nervous and when the clock hit 7 PM I had already drank two glasses of wine. I watched the door and expected her two walk in to restaurant just any second now. 7:15 PM. I was still staring at the door and I felt that my forehead was sweating. 7:30 PM. She was probably just stuck in traffic. I ordered another glass of wine and tried to make time pass faster. 8 PM. Where is she?? If she was this late she should at least have given me a call to let me know she’s on her way. 9 PM. It all made sense now. Her heart warming smile, her kind words and her longing eyes were just bullshit. She was just another bitch that played with people’s feelings, and I was just another fool that fell for it. How could I have been so stupid?? What was I thinking?

I left my table. My chair fell loudly to the floor and people stared at me as I stormed out of the restaurant. I wasn’t sad. I wasn’t going to let that bitch win. I was angry. Not at her, but at myself for being so easily fooled. I chucked the flowers in the first garbage bin I passed and kept walking down the street. Further down the street something had happened. Two police cars and an ambulance was blocking the sidewalk and at first I didn’t care. I just wanted to go home. But when I passed the scene of the accident I saw something. There was a body lying in middle of the sidewalk. The face was covered with a blanket but an arm was sticking out. I could tell that the arm belonged to a woman in her mid 20‘s and in her hand she was holding something. It was a bracelet.. made of  brown wooden pearls.

I didn’t stop. I kept walking. I didn’t look back. I didn’t cry. I just went straight back home. I went to bed, and I never woke up happy ever again.

title: Office love story (I have never written a short story in english before. Feedback is much appreciated.)

question: What does the story say about how to talk to women?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the story doesn't really say anything about how to talk to women.

question: What does the story say about the girl the narrator was interested in?

answer: The girl was around the narrator's age and worked in the same office. She was a pretty girl with a heartwarming smile. The narrator had been secretly interested in her for a long time. He finally gathered enough courage to talk to her and asked her out. She said yes.

critique: The girl dies in a car accident before their date.

critique: It is omitted that she was a coffee addict.

question: What does the story say about the relationship between the girl and the narrator?

answer: The narrator was interested in a girl at work, and finally asked her out. They dated for a couple of weeks before the narrator decided to ask her out on a more serious date. However, the girl didn't show up for their date after making the narrator wait for hours. Disheartened, the narrator left the restaurant, and on his way, he saw a body lying beside an ambulance.

critique: "They dated for a couple of weeks before the narrator decided to ask her out on a more serious date." - add that they never dated. She was just leading him on because of her feelings of nervousness.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator thinks the girl is dead.

critique: The response is incorrect. The girl did show up for their date, but the narrator left the restaurant because he thought she was playing with his feelings.

critique: The narrator left the restaurant, not the girl.

question: Summarize what happened to their dinner date at the Italian restaurant?

answer: It seems that she was in a fatal accident, but she is not mentioned by name. The narrator, who is waiting in the restaurant, decides to leave and throw away the flowers he has bought her, while he thinks she is not coming. He is not sad but angry at himself for being fooled. He seems to feel he was able to distance himself from losing the woman on their date.

critique: The narrator did not throw away the flowers he bought her.

critique: The narrator never feels any distance from the woman.

critique: The reason the narrator is angry is different in the answer, while the story is quite clear on why.

critique: "He is not sad but angry at himself for being fooled. He seems to feel he was able to distance himself from losing the woman on their date." - this is incorrect. The narrator was never able to distance himself from losing the woman. He was never happy again.

text: The response could be better structured - the reason why the lady didn't show up at the restaurant ought to be revealed after the narrator had left the restaurant.

category: coherence


text:
	Here I sit, the late september breeze holding back my hair while
 the ancient tree bark scratches my back as I bite into my last apple of
 the day. Through the tired branches full of leaves ready to hibernate, I
 can see the sun is getting ready for its daily rest. It’s time to go
home, time to leave this sanctuary where I can clear my mind and
hum and whistle for only the mosquitos and bugs to hear. No one to
watch, no one to listen. Sometimes it’s nice to just explore the woods,
 to just get away from life for a few hours and walk under low branches
 where a cold wind can whisper its secrets into your ear. I’ve been in
 these woods since I was little, my family used to live across the
 street; we used to come here as a family and explore this land
 together. This one time it was just my dad, two brothers and me, we
 were walking around a field of tall weeds on a warm summer evening,
 the air was fresh and the sun was gentle. We felt the earth moving
 under us and looked down, only to see hundreds of worm-sized
 snakes crawling over and around our now needle wide feet. It didn’t
 take long to realize we just so happened to intrude on the birth of the
 forest’s snake family. That day is one that I will remember for my life,
 unlike the snakes who would not remember that event even a single
 day after their journey around the moving trees.
	Growing older, I appreciated the nature brought by this forest
 more; I began to understand how everything in it is a family. The
 trees hold the ground which holds the trees. The animals and bugs
 help the roses and other painted petals explore the world and are
 given their grandparents’ fruits in exchange. Everything works
 together, and everything is happy. In the forest, everything is one;
 being in the forest, you are part of this family. Once I realized that, I
 finally could open my mind and see myself as more than just myself. I
 would spend hours and days exploring the rooted ground, using fallen
 uncles as bridges over rivers of mud to find a peaceful spot to sit and
 breath. After enough exploration, I never had much trouble finding a
 natural throne for me to sit and breath my thoughts into the wind. I
 learned how to give thoughts to leaves and pain to earthed limbs. The
 sun would look at me as I look into its ocean and understand its
 concern for me exploring its child.
	After many lives came and went in this forest, I found another
 person that I could open up to, a person that I knew I could bring into
 my sanctuary to see what I have seen and feel what I have felt. I
 found a friend that would walk these bridges and sit on the retired
 soldiers that rest in the forest. The forest became my home away
 from home. It became a place to open my mind and to smile without
 bounds. It became a place to bring my other half and tell them how I
 feel about them and about the world. Then one day, the forest
 became my knee as I asked my other half for permission to kiss them
 without regret and to hold them until the sun interrupts. The forest
 grew with us, we grew with the forest. We would come back to it
 occasionally; however, we realized that time was changing, time falls
 faster and life begins to get in the way of exploration. In order to
 remind this sanctuary that it is forever in our hearts, we left our love
 scar in the oldest and tallest root that was holding everyone’s hand in
 the forest.
	One day, we will return to this home to show we have not
 forgotten it. We will come to it and be one with the world, be one with
 each other. Be one with everything until we realize that by being one
 with everything, you are everything. Realizing that everything is
 connected in a way. Whispering, “I love you” into the wind and telling
 it your secrets so that one day another soul can venture into the
 forest and be chilled by the breeze that whispers secrets into their ear
 too.

title: The Forest

question: What state of mind is the writer trying to convey to their readers?

answer: The writer is trying to convey a sense of nostalgia and peace.

critique: The narrator is also trying to convey a sense of love.

critique: There is more than a sense of nostalgia and peace.

critique: The answer should mention the writer's love for the forest.

critique: The writer is also trying to convey a sense of love.