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I sat down on the bench, wiped the sweat off my brow, and set down my shovel and pail. July heat is merciless. I considered calling it a day; I wanted to go inside for some lemonade and a *Salade Nicoise* but the garden is never finished until Oiga has been watered.

I got Oiga many years ago at a flea market, a little field maple sapling I thought would add some charm to the corner of our garden. At that time I had just removed the cracked concrete in that corner, stained by bleach and paint, and had finally put in a new planter with fresh soil. I don't typically...name my plants, but Oiga grew to be somewhat of an anomaly. After two years of growth, a knot in Oiga's trunk left me with an uneasy feeling of pareidolia. The face that had twisted into place grew soft and flexible, until Oiga whimpered his first word, "fall". I was watering the morning glories along the fence when I heard it; the deep, dark, creaking voice caught me completely off guard. I went to go investigate the noise, and I shrieked when in the trunk there stood a face, yawning as if waking up from a long cat nap. I fainted.

My husband saw me collapse and brought me inside. Thankfully the soil in that corner softened the blow, and I was only out for a few minutes.

"Did you see it?"

"Yes."

"The face? The face in the tree I bought for the garden, *you saw it?*"

"Yes, I saw it."

"So I'm not crazy?"

"No, just a little lightheaded. Have some tea."

I gently pulled the mug toward my lips.

"I heard him. He said 'fall' just before I collapsed."

He looked away before gathering his thoughts.

"Do you know when my birthday is?"

"What? What are you talking about?"

"The tree, it said something else while you were out. Do you know when my birthday is?"

"Of course, it's..."

His birthday was in two days. He was turning thirty and...I had completely forgot.

"What did the tree say?"

"It said, 'don't expect anything.'"

We stared at each other for a minute in utter confusion.

That was years ago. Eventually we got used to Oiga's presence. We had company over a few times, and each time Oiga would predict something...bad. Something unfortunate. First we stopped having barbeques. Then people just stopped coming over for dinner altogether. No one wanted to hear it. Thankfully, Oiga's gruesome mug faced the corner of the garden. He had to yell to be heard. Even still, never once did Oiga predict good news. Scientists came to our home a few times to observe the tree, but they never found anything biologically unusual. And now I'm looking over to Oiga contemplatively, thinking just what to do with this particularly unusual field maple. I looked over at the axe by the screen door.

I noiselessly got up, grabbed the axe, and slowly walked toward this cursed tree.

"Inside."

I stopped.

"You should go inside."

"What if I don't want to go inside Oiga?"

"It wouldn't make any difference to me."

"Really?"

I tossed the axe from hand to hand.

"I know you have an axe. You should know that I know that by now."

"You want to tell me why I shouldn't use it?"

"Depending on when you get inside, either you'll feel grateful or regretful."

"Tell me why I shouldn't swing this axe, Oiga."

"Because it'll hurt. But also because you'll be out here for a while doing it, and I'm telling you, *go inside.*"

"Why don't you tell me why you would never predict anything positive."

Oiga was silent for a moment.

"Good things take time. Happy marriages, getting an education, rebuilding a nation, it all takes time. And there are so many variables the longer things take. They're wonderful things, but they aren't like tragedy. The bad, it happens all at once. Swiftly, abruptly, bombs drop. People die, bridges fall. They're awful, but they happen."

"What are you saying?"

"Start looking ahead. Forget about the past, and stop worrying about the future. Good things take time. If anything good is going to happen, it won't happen all at once. Conversely, there isn't much time left; you need to go inside."

For reasons I still can't explain to you, I set down the axe. Oiga was smart enough to know that this was just delaying the inevitable. He knew I was ready to chop him down. And yet, I trusted him enough to know that if I needed to go inside, I should probably do it. I turned around, opened the screen door, closed the sliding glass door and looked out at the garden.

It started...raining. The July heat turned to a muggy overcast almost immediately. It was drizzling. I was confused, but then in minutes, the rain picked up. Winds whipped Oiga's branches violently. I called my husband. He said he was only five minutes from home, and that the radio turned to an emergency broadcast...a flash flood warning.

He came in the door soaking wet; I was still standing by the screen door. Two feet of water rushing through the garden. The flowers were dead. The herb garden was uprooted and devastated. The planters split open and destroyed. And Oiga, still facing the corner of the garden, was waiting for the water to rise.

title: Oiga.

question: Summarize a surprise in the plot.

answer: The narrator's husband comes home and tells her that a flash flood warning has been issued. The narrator goes to the window and sees that Oiga is still facing the corner of the garden. The narrator calls her husband, who tells her that he is only five minutes from home. The narrator goes inside and closes the sliding glass door. The rain starts to pick up and the winds whip Oiga's branches. The narrator calls her husband, who tells her that the radio turned to an emergency broadcast.

text: The answer is redundant as it includes repeated details from the passage.

question: Summarize what the story says about good.

answer: The narrator and her husband are confused about the fact that Oiga, a field maple tree, was only predicting bad things. Oiga says that good things take time, and that there are so many variables. He says that bad things happen all at once, and that they are awful. The narrator and her husband are relieved when Oiga predicts the coming of rain.

critique: The answer should mention the rain Oiga predicted coming, which ended up being a flood that destroyed all their plants.

text: The answer inaccurately mentions that the narrator and her husband are relieved when Oiga predicts the coming of rain.

question: What does the story say about rain?

answer: At the end of the story, the narrator is warned about a flash flood by the radio. She calls her husband and tells him that she is still standing by the screen door. Immediately after, it starts raining, which causes a flash flood. The narrator seems to think that Oiga, her field maple tree, caused the rain.

critique: The narrator doesn't think Oiga caused the rain.

text: The answer inaccurately mentions that the narrator is warned about a flash flood by the radio. Her husband tells her that the radio has broadcasted a flash flood that was predicted by Oiga.

question: What does the story say about the narrator's career?

answer: No answer


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IGNATIUS JOHN XIV BAR SHAY ALLAH was the Patriarch of Antioch, and head of the Syriac Orthodox Church from 1483 until his death in 1493.[1]

Biography

Early life

John was the son of Shay Allah, who was the son of Sad al-Din, also known as Ibn al-Asfar, and his family was originally from Bartulli.[2] He was born in the city of Mardin in 1442,[3] and became a monk at the Monastery of Mor Hananyo.[4] Whilst at the monastery, John received a special education equal to that of Aziz, the nephew of Ignatius Chaleph of Maʿdan, Patriarch of Antioch,[5] and was educated in Syriac literature by the priests Simon of Amid and John of Mardin, as well as the monks Joshua of Basibrina and David bar Qashafo of Qalat al-Imra'a.[6]

Simon of Amid was a priest at the Church of the Forty Martyrs in Mardin, but died during his education of John and was succeeded by John of Mardin who educated him until he was eighteen.[7] David bar Qashafo taught John astronomy and an anonymous tutor from Constantinople educated him in the use of the use of the astrolabe.[8] John also received an education in dialectics, philosophy, and theology in Mardin, Syria and Egypt.[9]

In 1471, according to official church documents, John was ordained Bishop of Amid,[10] however, it has been argued that the ordination took place in 1474.[11] After his ordination as bishop, John became Ignatius Chaleph's companion and adviser, and was put in charge of his financial affairs.[12] John extended his title to Bishop of Amid and Sawro, so named after the village of Sawro near the Monastery of Mor Abay, where he resided.[13] As bishop, John immediately began to restore dilapidated churches and monasteries throughout his diocese,[14] including the Monastery of Mor Abay.[15]

He also restored the monasteries near the village of Qellet and bought and returned land formerly belonging to the monasteries that had been seized by Muslims.[16] As well as this, John built an extension to the Church of the Forty Martyrs in Mardin, and ransomed eight Georgian captives enslaved by Turkish raids.[17] John gifted the Georgians with horses and supplies to help them to return to Georgia.[18] As a result of his building activities, John accumulated large debts to Ibrahim Beg, Emir of Mardin.[19]

Patriarchate

Following the death of Ignatius Chaleph in 1483, the Syriac Orthodox population of Mardin was divided over who would succeed Chaleph, and John and Baselius Aziz, Maphrian of the East, Chaleph's nephew, and heir presumptive, were the two most popular contenders for the patriarchal throne. Certain bishops subsequently attempted to bribe Ibrahim Beg to usurp the patriarchal throne for themselves. John travelled to meet with Ibrahim Beg alongside the priest John bar Badre and Isa, chief layman of Mardin, and secured his aid so that he may secure the patriarchal throne. John's debts apparently influenced Ibrahim Beg to support John and the emir granted him an official seal of approval and a fine garment.[20]

As patriarch, John continued to build and restore churches and monasteries in the regions of Harput, Se'ert, Mardin, Amid, Nisibis and Mosul, such as the Church of Yoldath Aloho (Mother of God) in Harzam. The patriarch set out to restore a Syriac Orthodox church in the town of Nisibis, which had only three or four Syriac Orthodox households and was largely populated by Nestorians, adherents of a rival church known as the Church of the East. He initially excavated the Church of Mor Jacob with the intention of rebuilding it, but abandoned this effort, and rejected a suggestion to restore the Church of Mor Dimet in the outskirts of Nisibis, as it was too far from the centre. John was shown where the Church of Mor Batlo once stood in the town, and, satisfied by its location, had it excavated.[21] Under Islamic rule, Christians were permitted to only rebuild churches, not build new ones, and thus John, having excavated the ruins of the church, gained official permission from the qadis and faqihs (Islamic jurists) to rebuild the church.[22]

The Nestorians sent a delegation to the Emir of Mardin to protest the reconstruction of the Church of Mor Batlo and claimed there had not be a church there in the past, thus breaking Islamic law, and John was summoned to defend himself. John travelled from Nisibis to Mardin to answer the summons and, with the evidence of the foundations of the original church and the official permission of the qadis and faqihs of Nisibis, the allegations were dismissed and he returned to Nisibis. The Church of Mor Batlo was completed and rededicated as the Church of Mor Batlo and Yoldath Aloho following John's return. John cooperated with Baselius Aziz and the two stayed at the church prior to its consecration. Whilst at the church, John received an apparition of Mor Batlo in a dream who indicated the location of his remains and, in the following morning, John and Baselius Aziz dug at the indicated place and discovered the remains of Mor Batlo. John had a chapel built on the location and connected it to the church. He also appointed a bishop of Nisibis to minister to the Syriac Orthodox population of the town.[23] John's efforts in Nisibis were largely symbolic and were seen as the reclamation of their heritage. This is because the town of Nisibis was the diocese of Jacob of Nisibis, a highly venerated saint in the Syriac Orthodox Church, and thus to appoint a Syriac Orthodox bishop was to reclaim the town from the Nestorians.[24]

Baselius Aziz died shortly after the consecration of the Church of Mor Balto and Yoldath Aloho in 1487 and fear of Nestorian attacks in Mosul led John to travel to the city and restore the nearby Monastery of Mor Behnam.[25] John resolved an issue affecting the Monastery of Mor Hananyo whereby the monks faced harassment from Muslims who lived in a nearby orchard. John threatened the Emir of Mardin that himself and all other members of his church would relocate if the issue was not resolved. The emir capitulated and an agreement was reached by which the aforementioned orchard was exchanged for another property.[26] It was alleged that John was poisoned in 1493 by Joshua, Bishop of Sawro, who would later become patriarch in 1509.[27]

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[11] Palmer (2007), p. 192

[12] Palmer (2007), p. 199

[13] Palmer (1990), p. 23

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[24] Palmer (2007), p. 202

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[27] Palmer (1990), p. 46

title: Ignatius John XIV

question: Summarize the significance of John's post as a patriarch.

answer: John's post as a patriarch of Antioch was a time of great significance for him as he restored several churches and monasteries throughout the regions of Harput, Se'ert, Mardin, Amid, Nisibis, and Mosul. He also built a church in Nisibis which was a Syriac Orthodox church that was previously Nestorian. The Nestorians were an ancient group of Christians who were persecuted and replaced by the Syriac Orthodox Christians. John's efforts in Nisibis were largely symbolic and were seen as the reclamation of their heritage. His efforts were also seen as the restoration of the Syriac Orthodox Church's original diocese of Jacob of Nisibis.

critique: The first sentence is not relevant to the question.

critique: The answer is a summary of John's post as a patriarch, not a summary of the significance of his post.

critique: The last sentence is inaccurate and should be removed.

critique: John restored the Monastery of Mor Hananyo, not a church in Nisibis.

question: Summarize the most productive time period of John's career.

answer: John was ordained as bishop in 1471, and became Ignatius Chaleph's companion and advisor. He was put in charge of his financial affairs. John was the Patriarch of Antioch from 1483 until his death in 1493. During this time, he restored many churches and monasteries. He also excavated the Church of Mor Jacob and rededicated it as the Church of Mor Batlo and Yoldath Aloho. He also restored the Monastery of Mor Hananyo.

critique: John's employment as Chaleph's companion passed by 1476. The rest of the blurb is irrelevant.

text: The most productive time of John's career was as a patriarch; the first part of the response is irrelevant.

category: accuracy

question: Summarize the conditions under which Christian churches could no longer be built.

answer: In 1493, John received a dream in which he was shown the location of the remains of Mor Batlo. After the excavation, the remains were rediscovered, and the church was rebuilt and rededicated. However, the Nestorians sent a delegation to the Emir of Mardin to protest the reconstruction, claiming there had not been a church there in the past, which is a violation of Islamic law. John was summoned to defend himself, and he was able to prove the foundation of the original church with the permission of the qadis and faqihs of Nisibis, which the allegations were dismissed and he returned to Nisibis.

critique: The answer is not about the Islamic laws and the conditions under which Christian churches could no longer be built.


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[Once Floated as Allergan Target, Revance's Stock Drops as Crow’s Feet Drug Fails Trial] June 14, 2016
By Mark Terry, BioSpace.com Breaking News Staff

Newark, California-based REVANCE THERAPEUTICS ANNOUNCED yesterday that its DaxibotulinumtoxinA Topical Gel (RT001) failed to meet its co-primary and other endpoints. RT001 was being tested to treat patients with moderate to severe lateral canthal lines, otherwise known as crow’s feet.

The study’s endpoints were composite measurements of 2-point or greater and 1-point or greater improvement in crow’s feet between baseline and 28 days.

“We are disappointed with the results of the REALISE 1 trial,” said DAN BROWNE, president and chief executive officer of Revance, in a statement. “The data was unambiguous, and we do not plan to continue development of RT001 topical for crow’s feet. Based on these results, we have decided not to pursue the current clinical development plan for RT001 in axillary hyperhidrosis. We are grateful to all the patients and investigators for their participation in the REALISE 1 trial. Given the positive results in our recent Phase II BELMONT active comparator trial, we will focus our future development efforts and financial resources on DaxibotulinumtoxinA for Injection (RT002).”

Axillary hyperhidrosis is underarm sweating. RT002 is being developed to treat frown lines.

Revance was one of the companies floated as a POSSIBLE ACQUISITION TARGET by Dublin-based ALLERGAN . After the PFIZER-ALLERGAN merger fell through, both companies have shown an inclination for acquisitions. With Allergan’s strong presence in the dermatology market as the manufacturer of Botox, Revance would make sense.

And the company’s price is down at the moment. Shares traded for $40.78 on Nov. 11, 2015, dropped to $17.12 on Feb. 9, 2016, and rose only slightly to $20.67 on June 7 before falling to its current price of $14.44.

THESTREET RATINGS gave the company a “sell” rating with a score of D, saying, “This is driven by multiple weaknesses, which can be seen in multiple areas, such as its weak operating cash flow, generally disappointing historical performance in the stock itself and feeble growth in its earnings per share.”

Piper Jaffray REITERATED its “overweight” rating for the stock. Guggenheim reaffirmed a “buy” and set a price target of $55 on Friday, Mar. 4. Brean Capital reaffirmed a “buy” rating with a price target of $48 on May 24. Zacks Investment Research shifted from “hold” to “buy” on March 10. And lastly, SunTrust on March 23 gave it a “buy” rating with a $46 price target.

At the end of March 2016, the company had $236.6 million in cash and investments. Based on its plans and assets, the company indicates it has enough money to fund operations into the second quarter of 2018.

“Looking ahead to the second half of this year, we remain on track to initiate RT002 injectable Phase III clinical trials for glabellar lines and report interim Phase II results in cervical dystonia,” said Browne in a statement. “We recently held an End-of-Phase II meeting with the U.S. Food and Drug Administration (FDA) regarding our RT002 injectable program for glabellar lines. We believe the meeting was informative and productive. Meeting minutes are in process, and consistent with company and industry practice, we look forward to providing further updates when we have final minutes from the FDA.”

question: What does the article say about Revance's future outlook?

answer: At the end of March 2016, the company had $236.6 million in cash and investments. Based on its plans and assets, the company indicates it has enough money to fund operations into the second quarter of 2018. In the second half of 2016, Revance plans to initiate RT002 injectable Phase III clinical trials for glabellar lines and report interim Phase II results in cervical dystonia.

critique: On the one hand, I know you are reporting that they have enough money to fund operations, but on the other hand, the fact that they are in the process of publicizing their plans means the question is asking for the overall plan-which would be for the near future and not for 2018.

critique: The answer should mention the company's stock rating.

critique: The answer should mention their rating by TheStreet Ratings.

critique: The answer omits the company's plans for the future.

critique: Revance plans to do this in the second half of 2016, not in the second quarter of 2018.

critique: The answer should mention Revance's stock price.

question: What does the article say about regulations in the medical industry?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the article does not discuss regulations in the medical industry.

critique: The response is incorrect. The article does mention regulations.


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MARK S. ALDENDERFER (born 1950) is an American anthropologist and archaeologist. He is the MacArthur Professor of Anthropology at the University of California, Merced where he was previously the Dean of the School of Social Sciences, Humanities, and Arts. He has served as Professor of Anthropology at the University of Arizona, and the University of California, Santa Barbara. Aldenderfer received his Ph.D. from Penn State University in 1977. He is known in particular for his comparative research into high-altitude adaptation, and for contributions to quantitative methods in archaeology. He has also served as editor of several journals in anthropology and archaeology.

Research contributions

His research themes include the origins of settled village life, human adaptation to high altitude environments, hunting and gathering, and early plant and animal domestication. Aldenderfer has made important contributions to understanding the Archaic and Formative period peoples of the south-central Andes through active field projects in southern Peru. He has directed excavation projects at the sites of Asana, Qillqatani, and Jisk'a Iru Muqu, and survey projects in the Osmore valley (Moquegua, Peru) and in river valleys in the Lake Titicaca Basin. Since 1997 he has also conducted research on Buddhist and pre-Buddhist occupations in the Himalaya through field research in far western Tibet. He has also done fieldwork in Mesoamerica, Ethiopia, and in the United States.

Editorial work

From 2008-2018, Aldenderfer served in the role of editor-in-chief for the journal _Current Anthropology_[1]. He has served as the editor of _Latin American Antiquity_ and the _Society for American Archaeology Bulletin_ (now the _SAA Archaeological Record_).

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-   d’Alpoim Guedes, J., Lu, H., Li, Y., Spengler, R., Wu, X., and Aldenderfer, M. 2013 Moving Agriculture on the Tibetan Plateau: The Archaeobotanical Evidence. Archaeological and Anthropological Sciences (6): 255-269.
-   Aldenderfer, M. 2008 On text, materiality, and the Tibetan Buddhist religious architecture at Piyang: 900-1500 CE. In Religion in the Material World, edited by L. Fogelin, pp. 339–358. Center for Archaeological Investigations, Southern Illinois University, Carbondale.
-   Aldenderfer, M. 2007 Bringing down the mountain: standing stones on the northern and central Tibetan Plateau, 500 BCE-CE 500. In Cult in Context: Reconsidering Ritual in Archaeology, edited by D. Barraclough and C. Malone, pp. 242–248. Oxbow Books, Oxford.
-   Aldenderfer, M. 2007 Modeling the Neolithic on the Tibetan Plateau. In Late Quaternary Climate Change and Human Adaptation in Arid China, edited by D. Madsen, F. Chen, and X. Gao. Developments in Quaternary Science, Vol. 9. pp. 149–161. Elsevier, Amsterdam.
-   Aldenderfer, M. 2006 Modeling plateau peoples: The early human use of the world's high plateaux. World Archaeology.38(3): 357-370.
-   Aldenderfer, M. 2006 Defining Zhang zhung ethnicity: An archaeological perspective from far western Tibet. In Western Tibet and the Western Himalayas: Essays on History, Literature, Art, and Archaeology. Proceedings of the Tenth IATS, edited by Amy Heller and Giacomella Orofino, pp 1–21. Brill, Leiden.
-   Aldenderfer, M. 2005 Caves as sacred places on the Tibetan plateau. Expedition.47(3): 8-13. (Also published in Portuguese in the Journal of the Brazilian Speleological Society, 2006)
-   Aldenderfer, M. and H. Moyes 2005 The Valley of the Eagle: Zhang-zhung, Kyunglung, and the pre-Buddhist sites of far western Tibet. Expedition 47(2): 28-34.
-   Aldenderfer, M. and Y. Zhang 2004 The prehistory of the Tibetan plateau to the 7th C. AD: Perspectives and research from China and the West since 1950. Journal of World Prehistory 18(1): 1-55.
-   Aldenderfer, M. and H. Moyes 2004. Excavations at Dindun, a pre-Buddhist village site in far western Tibet. In Proceedings of the First International Conference on Tibetan Archaeology and Art, edited by Huo Wei and Li Yongxian, pp. 47–69. Center for Tibetan Studies, Sichuan University, Chengdu, China
-   Aldenderfer, M. 2003. Moving up in the world. American Scientist 91: 542-549. (also published in French in Spektrum de Wissenschaft, 2004)
-   Aldenderfer, M. 2003 Domestic rdo-ring? A new class of standing stone from the Tibetan plateau. Tibet Journal 28 (1&2): 3-20.
-   Aldenderfer, M. 2001 Piyang: A 10th/11th C A.D. Tibetan Buddhist temple and monastic complex in far western Tibet. Archaeology, Ethnology, and Anthropology of Eurasia. 4(8): 138-146. (also published in Russian).
-   Aldenderfer, M. 2001 Roots of Tibetan Buddhism. Archaeology 54(3): 610-12. (Also published in Year of Discovery 2002, Hatherleigh Press, NY)

[1] https://www.journals.uchicago.edu/journals/ca/laurence-ralph-appointed-editor

title: Mark Aldenderfer

question: What does the text say about the qualities that make a good archaeologist?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the text does not say anything about the qualities that make a good archaeologist.

critique: The answer should mention that the text doesn't say anything about the qualities that make a good archaeologist.

critique: The answer should mention that the text does not answer the question.

critique: The text does not address this question.

question: What does the text say about Mark Aldenderfer?

answer: Mark S. Aldenderfer is an American anthropologist and archaeologist. He is the MacArthur Professor of Anthropology at the University of California, Merced. Aldenderfer received his Ph.D. from Penn State University in 1977. He is known in particular for his comparative research into high-altitude adaptation, and for contributions to quantitative methods in archaeology. He has also served as editor of several journals in anthropology and archaeology.

critique: The answer is too long for the limited space available.

critique: The answer should mention his research themes.

question: What does the text say about some of Aldenderfer's research themes and contributions?

answer: His research themes include the origins of settled village life, human adaptation to high altitude environments, hunting and gathering, and early plant and animal domestication. He has made important contributions to understanding the Archaic and Formative period peoples of the south-central Andes through active field projects in southern Peru. He has directed excavation projects at the sites of Asana, Qillqatani, and Jisk'a Iru Muqu, and survey projects in the Osmore valley (Moquegua, Peru) and in river valleys in the Lake Titicaca Basin. Since 1997 he has also conducted research on Buddhist and pre-Buddhist occupations in the Himalaya through field research in far western Tibet. He has also done fieldwork in Mesoamerica, Ethiopia, and in the United States.

critique: The answer should mention the research themes that are not mentioned in the text.

question: What does the text say about Aldenderfer's writing and editorial career?

answer: Aldenderfer served as the editor-in-chief for the journal Current Anthropology from 2008 to 2018. He has also served as the editor of Latin American Antiquity and the Society for American Archaeology Bulletin.

critique: The answer should include the dates of Aldenderfer's service as editor.

critique: Does not mention his service as editor for the SAA Archaeological Record.

critique: The answer should mention his other editorial work.


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ZTERM is a shareware terminal emulator for Macintosh operating system. It was introduced in 1992 for System 7 and has been updated to run on macOS. Its name comes from its use of the ZModem file transfer protocol, which ZTerm implemented in a particularly high-performance package. In contrast to the built-in macOS Terminal app, which only communicates with other programs, ZTerm only communicates with hardware serial ports.

Description

When it was first introduced in 1992, ZTerm was one of the highest performing terminal emulators on the Mac, both in terms of basic text display as well as file transfer performance. ZTerm was widely regarded as the best terminal program on the Mac.[1][2][3]

Its hardware support included carrier detect (CD), hardware hangup (DTR) and hardware flow control, as well as speeds up to 119,200 bit/s on those machines that supported it. These features were not universally supported in Mac hardware, so many terminal emulators simply didn't bother to implement them at all. Even if these speeds were offered, most emulators of the era were so slow that they had trouble keeping up with faster modems, especially 9600 bit/s and faster.[4]

ZTerm supported one of the widest variety of file transfer protocols available on the Mac, including a full implementation of ZModem, YModem, YModem-G, almost all of the common varieties of XModem with different packet sizes and error correction methods,[5] and even the rare but useful B protocol (CIS-B) for use on Compuserve. ZTerm also supported auto-starting transfers from ZModem and CIS-B, where commands from the host triggered transfers from the client.

Additionally, ZTerm included a complete PC graphics character set and ANSI escape codes, including color. This made it one of the few terminals on the Mac that properly displayed ASCII art, and allowed full interaction with PC-based bulletin board systems (BBS) that used these features extensively. ZTerm added the ability to use the mouse to position the cursor, sending the correct stream of ANSI codes to move it from the current to the clicked location.

Finally, ZTerm included a 10-verb built-in scripting language that allowed it to automate basic tasks. In addition to be able to run these manually, when a service was dialed using an entry in the editable Dial menu, ZTerm would look for a script with the same name and run it automatically.[6]

Versions

The first public version of ZTerm was 0.9, which was released in 1992. Two major versions followed; 1.0 of April1994 was a major release that added 16-color ANSI support instead of 8-color, user-selected fonts including Shift JIS support, Kermit protocol support, and auto-opening of downloaded files. The later was useful when used with offline mail readers like Blue Wave. Version 1.0.1, released in October 1995, was mostly a bug-fix release.[7]

By the time that macOS was being released around 2002, the BBS world had largely disappeared. However, a number of devices (including some routers and lab equipment) still use serial ports to communicate, typically for diagnostic and debugging purposes. On 19 April 2001, Alverson released version 1.1b4 that ran on Mac OS X 10.0, Mac OS 8.6 and Mac OS 9 using Carbon.[8] Later a “Classic” version was released that did not require Carbon, allowing it to run on older machines that could not support Mac OS 8 or Mac OS 9. On 18 July 2011, Alverson released a Universal Binary version 1.2 that runs on Mac OS X 10.4 through Mac OS X 10.14. Because this version is not 64-bit, however, ZTerm will not run on Mac OS X 10.15 and above.

On modern machines without built-in serial ports, ZTerm can identify and use a wide variety of USB-based serial devices.[9] The list of supported hardware includes the standard Macintosh serial ports and Geoport on pre-PowerPC G3 CPU PowerPC Macintosh computers, the built-in Apple internal modem slot and the USB ports on PowerPC G3, PowerPC G4, PowerPC G5 and Intel-based Macintosh computers, and can be configured to work with adapters (including various USB port to serial port adaptors - such as those made by Keyspan,[10] and Apple internal modem slot to serial port adaptors - like the Stealth Serial Port[11] and the now discontinued Griffin Technology gPort, under OS X), giving it a unique use for BBSers and hardware tinkerers.

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title: ZTerm

question: What made ZTerm such an advanced terminal emulator for Macintosh in the 90s?

answer: Its file transfer protocol was one of the fastest at the time (ZModem). ZTerm supports a lot of different protocols, which was uncommon at the time. It also supported PC graphics character set and ANSI escape codes.

critique: "It also supported PC graphics character set and ANSI escape codes." - this is incorrect. ZTerm supported one of the widest variety of file transfer protocols available on the Mac, including a full implementation of ZModem, YModem, YModem-G, almost all of the common varieties of XModem with different packet sizes and error correction methods,[5] and even the rare but useful B protocol (CIS-B) for use on Compuserve. ZTerm also supported auto-starting transfers from ZModem and CIS-B, where commands from the host triggered transfers from the client."

critique: "It also supported PC graphics character set and ANSI escape codes." - this was already mentioned in the first sentence and should be removed.

critique: The third sentence is unnecessary and should be removed.

critique: The answer omits to mention ZTerm's hardware support.

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NORMAN HARDING (25 June 1929 – 9 December 2013) was an English trade unionist and tenants' leader who worked for the Workers Revolutionary Party whilst living in London.[1] He published the book, _Staying Red: Why I Remain a Socialist_, in 2005, which detailed his political activities from 1954 to 1985.

Early years

Born on 25 June 1929, Harding grew up in Shakespeare Street, Leeds, across from St. James's Hospital. His father was an engineer, but during the 1930s recession, had to take part-time work on the railways. His mother worked in a mill, and Harding remembered that she secured a wage rise for the mill workers by taking the advice of her father, which was to kick the belt off the pulley which powered the looms.[2] His father played piano, singing in public houses to supplement the family's income, but also sang at Leeds Town Hall in a production of Handel's _Messiah_, and with the Huddersfield Choral Society.

In 1935, the Harding family moved to 4 Accommodation Road, Leeds, with the young Harding attending York Road School. After the outbreak of World War II, the family were moved to 93 Poole Crescent, Cross Gates, where his mother obtained the position of managing the small Pendas Way railway station, at Manston, Leeds, which was part of the Leeds/Wetherby Railway route. Her duties included loading and unloading heavy parcels, and releasing homing pigeons from baskets.[3] In 1943, at fourteen years of age, Harding left Cross Gates school, and after various jobs started work as a trimmer at John Barran's clothing factory.

National service and politics

Harding was called up for National Service after the war, completing his basic training at RAF Padgate, RAF Honiley, Castle Bromwich, and Hereford. He was then sent to Hamburg to serve in the RAF's 5352 Wing at Hamburg's Fuhlsbüttel airport, which was involved with the Berlin Airlift.[4] He made friends with German families in the area, even though fraternisation was forbidden.

After being demobbed, he became a delegate for the Leeds No. 2 branch of the National Union of Tailors and Garment Workers, and then a delegate for the Leeds City Labour Party. (Harding's great-uncle became a member of IWW (Industrial Workers of the World) when he was working in Canada).[5] In 1957, already being a member of the Cross Gates Ward Labour Party, Harding joined the Cross gates Tenants' and Householders' Association,[6] and edited a community newspaper, the '’Miner'’. In the 1970s, he moved to London, and would live there for twenty years, working for the Socialist Labour League (later called the Workers Revolutionary Party). His opposition to corruption in the Party led him to participate in the expulsion of leader Gerry Healy, in 1985. Initially accused of “non-communist relations”, it was later reported that Healy had sexually assaulted over twenty-six female comrades.[7][8]

Marriage and authorship

After time spent in Australia during 1986, he returned to Leeds, staying at the house of his brother's ex-wife and her four children, at 40 Eastwood Crescent, Swarcliffe. During a holiday in Sliema, Malta, he proposed marriage to her on 3 June 1988, and were married on 5 August of the same year, when Harding was 58 years old. In 1994, Harding was diagnosed with a psychological medical condition, so he and his wife moved from Swarcliffe to Garforth, before moving to a bungalow in Micklefield. He published the book, _Staying Red: Why I Remain a Socialist_, in 2005.[9][10] It has been called “the only serious, autobiographical-historical, sustained approach to the story of the Socialist Labour League/Workers Revolutionary Party so far”.

In 2007, the Leeds Tenants' Federation awarded Harding a glass plaque for “outstanding contributions to the community”.[11] In 2008, it was reported that Harding was working on a book about the Leeds-born Doris Storey; the winner of two Olympic swimming gold medals at the 1938 British Empire Games in Sydney, Australia.[12] Harding lived at Woodview Court,[13] Swarcliffe, with his wife, until his death in December 2013.[14][15]

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title: Norman Harding

question: Why is Norman Harding considered important?

answer: He was an English trade unionist and tenants' leader who worked for the Workers Revolutionary Party. In his book, Staying Red: Why I Remain a Socialist, he detailed his political activities from 1954 to 1985.

critique: The answer should mention his work for the tenants' association.

critique: Harding's work for the Workers Revolutionary Party isn't necessarily relevant to the question.

critique: The answer should mention his work with the Leeds Tenants' Federation.

critique: The answer should mention the Leeds Tenants Federation award.

question: What does the text say about Harding's military career?

answer: Harding was called up for National Service after the war, completing his basic training at RAF Padgate, RAF Honiley, Castle Bromwich, and Hereford. He was then sent to Hamburg to serve in the RAF's 5352 Wing at Hamburg's Fuhlsbüttel airport, which was involved with the Berlin Airlift. He made friends with German families in the area, even though fraternisation was forbidden.

critique: The answer should mention that Harding was a member of the RAF.

critique: It's omitted that Harding was diagnosed with a psychological medical condition in 1994.

critique: Harding's National Service term is mentioned twice. Improve the accuracy of the sentence by removing the repetition.

question: What did Norman's brother think about Norman proposing to his ex-wife?

answer: That information isn't known.

critique: It is not stated that this information is not known.

critique: It is not stated but it can be assumed that he was happy about it.

critique: It is true that he did not live him, which was stated in the passage, but the passage did mention what she thought about Norman marrying her. CO thus there is no answer to the question.

question: Why was Norman considered a hero of his community?

answer: He was described as a hero of his community for his outstanding contributions to the community.

critique: The answer should mention the Leeds Tenants' Federation award.

critique: The question asks why Harding was considered a hero, not what qualities or events from his life achieved that. Adjust the wording to reflect the clarity of the question.

text: The answer should explicitly mention that the article doesn't specify Norman Harding's contributions apart from his political activities.

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The SHIRE OF WOONGARRA was a local government area located to the south and east of the regional city of Bundaberg. The shire, administered from Bundaberg itself, covered an area of , and existed as a local government entity from 1885 until 1994, when it amalgamated with Gooburrum to form the Shire of Burnett.

History

[Map of Barolin Division and adjacent local government areas, March 1902. Legend: Bundaberg Municipality (1), Woongarra Division (19)] The Barolin Division was established on 11 November 1879 under the _Divisional Boards Act 1879_.[1] On 30 October 1885, part of Barolin Division was separated to create Woongarra Division to serve the region south of the Burnett River.[2][3][4]

With the passage of the _Local Authorities Act 1902_, Woongarra Division became the Shire of Woongarra on 31 March 1903,[5] while Barolin Division became the Shire of Barolin.[6]

In 1909, the Woongarra Shire had an area of 35½ square miles, with a population of 3200, with 736 ratepayers and a capital value of properties totalling £206,736. The rates collected in 1908 totalled £2378, and the loan indebtedness is £4956 9s 9d.[7]

On 21 December 1917, the Shire of Barolin was dissolved and its area was split between the City of Bundaberg and the Shire of Woongarra.[8][9]

[Barolin Chambers, Woongarra Shire Office, 1928 (built in 1913)] The Shire's offices were located in 9 Barolin Street, Bundaberg.

On 21 November 1991, the Electoral and Administrative Review Commission, created two years earlier, produced its second report, and recommended that local government boundaries in the Bundaberg area be rationalised. The _Local Government (Bundaberg and Burnett) Regulation 1993_ was gazetted on 17 December 1993, and on 30 March 1994, the Shire of Woongarra was amalgamated with the Shire of Gooburrum to form the Shire of Burnett.

Towns and localities

-   Alloway
-   Ashfield
-   Avoca
-   Bargara
-   Branyan
-   Burnett Heads
-   Calavos
-   Coonarr
-   Coral Cove
-   Electra
-   Elliott
-   Elliott Heads
-   Givelda
-   Innes Park
-   Kalkie
-   Kensington
-   Kepnock
-   Kinkuna
-   Millbank
-   Mon Repos
-   Pine Creek
-   Port of Bundaberg
-   Qunaba
-   Rubyanna
-   South Bingera
-   Thabeban
-   Windermere
-   Woongarra

Population

  Year   Population
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  1921   2,513
  1933   3,287
  1947   3,345
  1954   3,704
  1961   4,149
  1966   4,934
  1971   5,150
  1976   8,791
  1981   9,865
  1986   11,915
  1991   16,491

Chairmen

-   1885–1886 John Cran [10][11]
-   1887-1889: J. Y. Walker [12]
-   1890–1893 John Cran (again)[13]
-   1894–1895 T. Williams [14]
-   1897: John Cran (again)[15]
-   1898: G. A. Waite [16]
-   1905: W. J. Clements[17]
-   1927: Robert Oswald Nowell Strathdee [18]

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title: Shire of Woongarra

question: What does the text say about the area in the 1990s?

answer: The area is to the south and east of the regional city of Bundaberg. The area was administered from Bundaberg itself. The area covered an area of and was a local government entity from 1885 until 1994 when it amalgamated with Gooburrum to form the Shire of Burnett.

critique: The question is not asking for the history of Woongarra.

critique: The question asks about the 1990s, not the 1990s.

critique: The area's administration is irrelevant.

critique: The area's size and the year it amalgamated with Gooburrum are irrelevant.

critique: The answer is irrelevant to the question.

critique: Remove everything to the right, since we know the area was being administered from Bundaberg and we are discussing the latter part of its tenure as a local government entity.

critique: The area was not a government entity in the 1990s.

critique: The area was not to the south and east of the regional city of Bundaberg.


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Hi, I'm not really a writer. I wrote the below piece and just wanted to see what other people think of it. First reddit post, and I'm hoping it goes well. :)

"It had been a particularly cold winter. The white frost blanketed the ground, killing everything that lived, as if Death himself laid down his tattered cloak over the land. I soon forgot what warmth was. The feeling itself frozen and shattered from my memory. There was only the cold left to keep us poor folk warm.

It was during that desolate winter that I had the pleasure of meeting Joe, a stoic man who had come from farther up North, seeking a warmth his body didn’t feel and his mind couldn’t remember. When I saw the crystal clear blue of his eyes, I remember thinking that the cold was in him, in those eyes, and he would never escape from it. But I was sillier back then.

I was young. A girl alone in the world, left to my own devices on a neglected and deserted ranch. Or at least what was left of it. I sometimes thought to myself I was Jonah, and the dilapidated house around me the dying carcass of that biblical whale. The “farmhouse” I lived in had been falling down around me for the better part of my stay, and showed no signs of slowing. I had found it like this and it had stayed like this, as broken and empty as I was.

Most people kept their distance, as I was seen as undesirable. Whether I thought myself worthy of such a distinction or not I did not care. I only cared that they thought I was worthy of distance. Peace of mind was something rarely afforded to most in this world, and as long as I was an unnamed presence meant to be quarantined from the normal folk I was afforded that peace of mind.

Until Joe. We met in the cold and it was the cold that sustained us until the frost became too bitter. He had been sleeping in “my” barn, or at least what was left of it. I rarely ventured out of the main house, as it was there I felt the most safe. I sometimes looked out at it from the kitchen window, mostly in passing, to check if it was still there, giving it’s sorry condition.

I watched through a spiderweb of cracked and stained glass as he went to and from the barn. I didn’t know where he went, but around dusk he would always stumble back to the shelter that the barn provided.

I had been alone for so long by then that his presence wasn’t easily articulated into clear feelings one way or the other. I knew he might be dangerous, but I also knew he was like me. A connection flowed from that kitchen window to the door of that barn. We were both a body without a soul. A life wasted, created in misery, and destined to die with a whimper not a bang. So I decided to speak to him, the first person in a long time I felt connected to on any kind of level worth a damn.

How he had been surviving in the barn for this long with it’s missing shingles and barely patched south wall, which had been through absolute hell during tornado season two years past, was a mystery to me. Everyday had found the weather turning colder as if the ranch was turning solid, and the barn wasn’t much protection. I didn’t know how to approach him without scaring him, as I had come to think of him as a solitary fellow, never having seen anyone in his company while he stayed on the ranch.

So I knocked. My knuckles meeting the frayed once-red, now pink, wood that covered the brown oak that made up the barn. The sound of my knocks were small, my shivering not only a result of the winter wind, but nevertheless he heard. Joe had been a man slow to talk when we first met, but he opened up as our talks grew.

It was around then that I began to realize his eyes were more the blue of the ocean water that I had sometimes dreamed about than frozen ice. We talked of many things, and when I told him of how I felt like Jonah, his laugh brought back something in me, and I laughed along with him. It was the shared laughs more than anything that kept me coming back to that barn for so long.
He introduced a warmth that didn’t stretch very far but radiated with an unparalleled intensity between the two of us. We spent a month together on that cold farm, keeping the frost at bay. Eating when we could, sleeping, and most importantly living.

He and his watery eyes eventually moved on. But those days I kept with me for a very long time. I can still remember the bitter cold in my old bones, but I also remember the warmth that Joe and I rediscovered, that had been lost to us in the frigid world, until it to was killed off by the frost."

title: I wrote a very short story called Winter's Frost and am looking for feedback. Thanks!

question: From the story's first paragraph, what imagery does the narrator use to describe how cold the winter was?

answer: The narrator describes the winter as a time when the white frost blanketed the ground, killing everything that lived. The narrator describes the cold as if Death himself laid down his tattered cloak over the land.

question: What does the story say about the relationship between Joe and the narrator?

answer: The narrator and Joe met in a cold winter on a deserted ranch. They both had similar life circumstances and decided to keep each other company until the frost was too unbearable. They spent a month together on the ranch, eating and living. The narrator was never alone again.

critique: This response is not clear in its intention. It is not stated that the narrator was never alone again.

critique: It's not just the narrator who was never alone again.

critique: The narrator was never alone again, but Joe left eventually.

question: What does the story say about why people kept their distance from the narrator?

answer: The narrator was seen as undesirable by the people of her town. She was an unnamed presence that was quarantined from the normal folk. She was a girl alone in the world, left to her own devices on a neglected and deserted ranch. She was young and had the mind of a child. She was also seen as undesirable because she was living in a broken and empty house that was falling down around her. Most people kept their distance from her because of these things.

critique: It is omitted that she was disliked because of her undesirable attitude and her habit of aversion.


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JIM MCLAUGHLIN (born November 18, 1960)[1] is an American volleyball coach. He was most recently the head coach of the women's volleyball team at Notre Dame.[2]

Teams under McLaughlin's coaching have accomplished two national championships, six Final Four appearances (most recently in 2013), six trips to the Elite Eight, two national players of the year, three Pac-12 (formerly the Pac-10) Conference titles, and 13 players that combined for 28 AVCA All-America awards. McLaughlin was named the 2004 NCAA National Coach of the Year and received the 2002, 2004, 2005, and 2013 Pac-12 Coach of the Year awards.

Before Washington, he spent seven seasons as the men's head coach at USC, where he won the 1990 national championship and finished as runner-up in 1991, followed by a four-year run in the Big 12 Conference leading the women's program at Kansas State.

Through the 2013 season, McLaughlin had a 326-87 () record with the Huskies in 13 seasons.

Collegiate career

McLaughlin attended Santa Monica Junior College (1980–81), where he played volleyball for two years and transferred to UC Santa Barbara (1982–83). He was the Gauchos' starting setter for two seasons, earning honorable mention All-America honors as a senior.

Head coach

USC

McLaughlin was the head coach for the USC Trojans men's volleyball team for seven seasons. In his first year as head coach in 1990, he led the Trojans to the NCAA Men's Volleyball Championship match, defeating Long Beach State, and finished as runner-up the following year. While at USC, McLaughlin's teams were ranked in the top 10 five times, while 15 players earned All-America accolades, led by two-time national player of the year Bryan Ivie.

Kansas State

McLaughlin spent four seasons building the Kansas State women's program into a national power; he compiled an 82-43 () record and took the Wildcats to four consecutive NCAA tournaments. In his final season, McLaughlin led Kansas State to a 22-9 () record, a program-best No. 16 national ranking and its first-ever trip to the NCAA Sweet 16, before losing to top-seeded Wisconsin.

During his tenure in Manhattan, two Wildcats earned All-America honors, seven were named to the All-Big 12 first team and 15 garnered first-team academic all-conference accolades. McLaughlin also was honored as the 1999 Big 12 Conference Coach of the Year.

Washington

When McLaughlin took over the Washington program in 2001, the team was last in the Pac-10 Conference. In his first year at UW, he led the Huskies to an 11-16 record and a 4-14 mark in the Pac-10. The team's 11 wins in 2001 were the most for the program since 1997. Just one year later, the Huskies went 20-11 and made the NCAA second round. Since 2003, Washington has not won fewer than 23 matches or lost more than nine in any season.[3]

In 2004, the Huskies won their first-ever Pac-10 title, and McLaughlin earned his first AVCA National Coach of the Year honor. In his fifth year at UW in 2005, he led Washington to its first-ever NCAA Women's Volleyball Championship and a 32-1 () record as Washington swept all six of their matches in the tournament,[4] including top-ranked Nebraska in the final at the Alamodome in San Antonio.[5] McLaughlin was named the Pac-10 Coach of the Year, and made history as the first coach in NCAA history to win a national championship in both men and women's volleyball, having led the USC men's team to a national title in 1990.[6]

In 2006, he led UW to its third straight national semifinal, but the Dawgs fell to runner-up Stanford.[7][8]

The NCAA Championships were hosted in Seattle at KeyArena at Seattle Center in 2013. The Huskies, led by AVCA National Player of the Year and Honda Award Winner Krista Vansant, won the Pac-12 title and reached the Final Four, but fell in straight sets in the semifinals to eventual national champion Penn State.[9][10]

In his 13 years as head coach, McLaughlin established Washington volleyball as a championship-caliber team. Under his leadership, Washington made an appearance in the NCAA Tournament every year except in his first year in 2001 and boasts a .789 winning percentage. There have been 51 players that have been honored with All-Conference selections, 50 Academic All-Conference honorees, 31 All-Americans and 8 Academic All-Americans since McLaughlin’s arrival.[11]

Notre Dame

McLaughlin was named the women's volleyball head coach at the University of Notre Dame on January 17, 2015. He resigned his position in June 2018 due to severe back issues. [12]

Quick facts

-   winning percentage at UW (through 2013)

-   31 All-Americans
-   51 All-Conference selections
-   50 Academics All-Conference honorees
-   24 Professional Players produced
-   12 Straight NCAA Tournament appearances
-     8 Academic All-Americans
-     4 Final Four Appearances
-     1 National Championship

Head coaching record

Men's college volleyball

Women's college volleyball

-   Final Pac-10 season was 2010; became Pac-12 in 2011

Awards and honors

-   2013 – Pac-12 Coach of the Year
-   2005 – Pac-10 Coach of the Year
-   2004 – AVCA National Coach of the Year, AVCA Pacific Region Coach of the Year, Pac-10 Coach of the Year
-   2002 – Pac-10 Coach of the Year
-   1999 – Big 12 Coach of the Year

Personal

Jim is married to the former Margaret Jarc, a four-year soccer monogram winner at the University of Notre Dame. They have three daughters, Megan, Molly, and Marit.

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title: Jim McLaughlin (coach)

question: What does the text say about the skills needed to become a volleyball player?

answer: No answer

critique: It's omitted that there are no skills mentioned.

critique: The text does not say anything about the skills needed to become a volleyball player.

critique: The text doesn't say anything about the skills needed to become a volleyball player.

critique: The question is asking for information that is not contained in the text.

critique: The answer should mention that the text does not say anything about the skills needed to become a volleyball player.

question: What does the text say about Jim McLaughlin's collegiate career?

answer: McLaughlin attended Santa Monica Junior College (1980–81), where he played volleyball for two years and transferred to UC Santa Barbara (1982–83). He was the Gauchos' starting setter for two seasons. McLaughlin attended Santa Monica Junior College (1980–81), where he played volleyball for two years and transferred to UC Santa Barbara (1982–83). He was the Gauchos' starting setter for two seasons, earning honorable mention All-America honors as a senior.

critique: The response includes the same information twice.

critique: The second sentence is redundant and should be removed.

critique: The first sentence is in the wrong place. Multiple sentences of the same thing spoils the flow.

question: Summarize McLaughlin's head coaching career.

answer: McLaughlin was the head coach for the USC Trojans men's volleyball team for seven seasons. He was the head coach for the Kansas State women's program for four seasons. He was the head coach for the Washington Huskies for 13 seasons. He was the head coach for the Notre Dame women's volleyball team for two seasons.

critique: Doesn't say at which point the last season was.

critique: The answer should mention McLaughlin's awards.

critique: It is omitted that he was named the 2004 NCAA National Coach of the Year and received the 2002, 2004, 2005, and 2013 Pac-12 Coach of the Year awards.

critique: The answer omits McLaughlin's time at Santa Monica Junior College.

critique: The answer omits McLaughlin's time at Santa Monica Junior College and UC Santa Barbara.

critique: It is omitted that he won the 1990 national championship and finished as runner-up in 1991.

question: What are some of McLaughlin's most notable accomplishments?

answer: He was named the 2004 NCAA National Coach of the Year and received the 2002, 2004, 2005, and 2013 Pac-12 Coach of the Year awards. He has a 326-87 record with the Huskies in 13 seasons. He led the USC Trojans men's volleyball team to the NCAA Men's Volleyball Championship match, defeating Long Beach State, and finished as runner-up the following year. He led the Kansas State women's program into a national power. He led Washington to its first-ever Pac-10 title, and McLaughlin earned his first AVCA National Coach of the Year honor. He led Washington to its first-ever NCAA Women's Volleyball Championship and a 32-1 record as Washington swept all six of their matches in the tournament.

critique: The response includes extraneous information that is not useful for the task.

critique: Remove the detail about McLaughlin's time at USC - we're just interested in his time at K State and U Washington.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: There are two sentences that do not pertain to McLaughlin's most notable achievements.

critique: "He led the Kansas State women's program into a national power. He led Washington to its first-ever Pac-10 title, and McLaughlin earned his first AVCA National Coach of the Year honor. He led Washington to its first-ever NCAA Women's Volleyball Championship and a 32-1 record as Washington swept all six of their matches in the tournament." - irrelevant information that can be removed.


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WELLS/GOODFELLOW is a neighborhood of St. Louis, Missouri. The borders of the neighborhood are defined by the St. Louis city limits on the north-western edge, Dr. Martin Luther King Drive to the south-west, Natural Bridge Avenue to the north-east and Union Boulevard to the south-east.

Education

-   Gundlach Elementary School
-   Pierre Laclede Elementary School
-   Stowe Middle School
-   Langston Middle School

History

The rich history of this area, particularly the streets close to the north and west city limits, has been all but lost to time. Part of the area dates to before the Civil War, and at one time it was the location of the popular amusement center Suburban Garden at Kennerly and Hodiamont, but its greatest growth came in the 1920s and 1930s with a mixture of single family homes, duplexes, four-family flats and apartment buildings. Before World War II the area was considered a particularly attractive community in which to live and rear a family. Hard to believe today, but it was semi-rural. For example, on Roosevelt Place large grassy pastures extended west from the four-family flat at 5865-67 to the western city limits and north to the Wabash railroad tracks. On the west ran the City Limits streetcar line on an in-the-woods embankment a block east of Kienlen Avenue; on the north ran the Wabash corridor, with heavy rail traffic including the Wabash Cannonball at 10:08 each morning and the Bluebird at 10:13. Leschen Rope and Wire factory on Hamilton between Kennerly and Roosevelt hummed with activity day and night and had its own railroad spur leading from the Wabash tracks. The four-family flat at 5865-67 Roosevelt turned out a Missouri lieutenant governor, a highly awarded nurse, a successful sculptor, and a celebrated teacher. Next to the building the occupant of one flat kept horses in a barn and blackberry patches stretched westward. A well-known case involving alien abductions—or the illusion of them—also took place in this building over an extended time beginning in the 1940s before there were any flying saucer images or knowledge in the culture and it affected children in multiple families in the building. The case is known to experts as high as the university level; the children involved only learned of each other's experiences, and the effects on their subsequent lives, 40 years after the fact. Laclede School on Kennerly Avenue at Goodfellow was, through the 1940s and early '50s, considered a choice grade school in the city for both students and teachers. The principal Fred S. Milam was well known for hiring the best teachers and then letting them teach, valuing autonomy and expertise. Likewise, the Wellston library was one of the most popular in the city; the children came from middle-class or lower-middle-class homes without many extras and kept the small library jammed on Saturdays as they selected which books they would next read. The area mixed a heavy Catholic population and a heavy Jewish population with other religions with harmony. When the exodus to the suburbs in the late 1950s moved swiftly the neighborhoods underwent a drastic change and today much of the area's structures are long gone. Many people who grew up in the area believe the next logical development is redevelopment of the area, as has happened with hard-luck areas in many other cities. Laclede School notably held on to its reputation through hard years for the neighborhood and the beautiful building now boasts a large gym in what had been the girls' playground.

Demographics

In 2010 Wells/Goodfellow's racial makeup was 97.5% Black, 0.7% White, 0.2% Native American, 0.2% Asian, and 1.4% Two or More Races. 0.6% of the people were of Hispanic or Latino origin.[1]

[1] http://dynamic.stlouis-mo.gov/census/neigh_comp.cfm

title: Wells/Goodfellow, St. Louis

question: Summarize the historical context for the diversification of the neighborhood.

answer: No answer

critique: The article has a lot of information about the history of the area and its diversity.

critique: The question is asking for a summary of the historical context for the diversification of the neighborhood, not for an answer that does not exist.

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I could feel the powerful throbbing of my racing heart against the wet stone floor. As I laid there I could sense every motion within my body from the blood rushing from my fingers to my toes and the expansion of my lungs as I inhaled, the following emptiness as I exhaled and every single hair standing up on my back from the cold.

I was naked and I felt cold. There was naught but a light breeze breaking the thundering silence. I opened my eyes only to close them again. They felt so very dry. After I rubbed my eyes I once again opened them to find myself lying down in the dark. I stood up and noticed my lack of clothing. The cool breeze had stopped. The following silence was so unbearable that I started tapping my bare feet against the stone floor. Not a sound. I tapped harder. Not a sound. I crouched down and started smacking the floor with the palm of my hand. Not a sound. I stomped on the stone floor trying to create the smallest inkling of a noise as my desperation grew more intense. Not a sound. I jumped up and down but not a sound wave was produced.

That's when the roar that can only be described as infinite started. The mind numbingly powerful roar the likes of which I have never heard. It was a sound that had no source and had no end. A sound that traveled indefinitely and that could not be escaped. I turned around cowering while covering my ears, screaming, trying to overpower the sound, to no avail. That is when I noticed the sliver of light in the dark. I made my way towards it and it turned out to be the crack of a door. On the other side of the door was a desert and the warmth of the sands heated the air through the doorway and I felt beckoned to lie down in it.

I thrust myself through the doorway to be engulfed by the warm sands but I could not feel it. I knew the sand was warm but I could not feel it against my skin. I dug deeper trying to get the sand in closer against my skin but I could not feel the heat. I could feel the weight of the sand pressing against me as I made my way down in the sand but could not feel the heat. I kept digging until I could no longer breathe. The pressure against my chest was immense and yet I did not feel the need to breathe, so I continued digging.

Light. I was instantly blinded as it hit my eyes. I felt shaken and the weight was unloaded but there was still an overbearing pressure and there was the cold, the now much more extreme cold cold. As I looked towards the horizon of the desert I could see the outlines of another person. A person wearing something that was being carried by the wind. A dress perhaps? Charging through the sand with not a care for anything but to reach this dress wearing someone I thought, what is this place? What am I doing here? Why am I here?

As I reached the figure in the dress I grabbed it's arm and swung it around only to see a young woman bloodied on one side of her face with a cut splitting her head on the left side. On the right side there was but the remnants of a what was once a face, now charred beyond recognition. I could recognize her. I closed my eyes and as I opened them again I came to.

I was in a car. In the driver's seat. There was smoke everywhere, as well as shards of glass. I looked up and there she was just opposite to me, in a car crumpled up in to the hood of mine, engulfed in flames. My sight got blurry and I heard sirens in the distance. What is this?

title: A desolate inside

question: Summarize the painful sensations the narrator experiences.

answer: The narrator feels the powerful throbbing of the racing heart against the stone floor. Their eyes feel dry and they feel the cold. They dig into the sand, which is very hot, but they do not feel it. The narrator also feels a lot of pressure as they dig into the sand.

critique: Add some extra detail about the injuries that she receives in the car.

critique: The narrator's eyes feel dry because they are closed.

critique: The narrator is digging into the sand to try and get the heat to penetrate their skin, but they can't feel it. This is the opposite of what the answer says.

critique: The narrator does feel the heat of the sand.

critique: The narrator feels the cold when they are outside the sand.

critique: The narrator does not feel the heat of the sand.

critique: The narrator is not digging into the sand.

text: The answer omits that the narrator was instantly blinded by a light, felt an overbearing pressure, and extreme cold.

category: coverage

question: Summarize the story's plot twist.

answer: As the narrator digs in the sand, they pan out to see a car and the narrator's unconscious body in the driver's seat. They see the woman who has been pursuing them, bloodied and charred beyond recognition, in the passenger seat. The narrator then wakes up from the dream.

critique: The woman is not in the passenger seat. She is in the car crumpled up in the hood of the narrator's car.

critique: The woman is not in the passenger seat, but the narrator's body is in the driver's seat.

text:
-The first sentence of the answer is inaccurate. The narrator does not see a car and their unconscious body in the driver's seat. Instead, they see a woman with a bloodied and burnt face. Correct this error.
-The story does not state that the woman was pursuing the narrator. Delete this.
-The story does not say that the narrator was dreaming. The narrator was unconscious from an accident. Correct this error.

question: What does the story say about how the narrator wound up in the place with the wet stone floor?

answer: The narrator was driving when he lost consciousness and crashed his car. He was naked and cold, and there was a roaring sound that seemed to have no source or end. He was drawn to a crack in the door, and when he went through it, he found himself in a desert. He could not feel the heat of the sand against his skin, and he kept digging until he could no longer breathe. He felt a flash of light and saw the outlines of a person in the distance, and then he came to. He was in a car, and the person he saw was the woman he crashed into.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator was naked and cold when he woke up.

critique: The story does not explain how the narrator wound up in the stone room. It only states he was on the floor naked.


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_'Edmund (or EDMOND) Meyrick_' (or MEYRICKE) (1636 – 24 April 1713) was a Welsh cleric and benefactor of Jesus College, Oxford, where scholarships are still awarded in his name. He is a member of the Meyrick family.

Life

Meyrick was born at Garthlwyd, Llandderfel (near Bala, Merionethshire) and christened in Llandderfel on 11 June 1636. He attended four schools, including one year at Ruthin School, before matriculating at Jesus College, Oxford in 1656. He was elected to a scholarship in 1658 and obtained his BA degree in 1659.[1] He was ordained both deacon and priest by Robert Skinner, Bishop of Oxford, on 30 August 1660 in the chapel of New College, Oxford.[2] In 1662, he was elected to a probationary Fellowship of the college, but married in 1663 and became ineligible for a full fellowship. He became vicar of Eynsham on 10 August 1663.[3] He was chaplain to Richard, Earl of Carbery — the Meyricks and the Carberys being related – and this connection led to Meyrick's appointment to a number of lucrative positions in West Wales.[4] Meyrick became vicar of Llangathen in 1665, vicar of Llanegwad and a Canon of St David's Cathedral in 1667, rector of Burton, Pembrokeshire in 1670, treasurer of St David's in 1690 and rector of Penboyr in 1713. He was also a canon of Christ College, Brecon and vicar of Carmarthen; he held many of these positions at the same time. He died in Carmarthen, where he was then living, on 24 April 1713, and was buried in St Peter's Church; a memorial to him was placed on the north wall of the chancel.[5]

Bequests

Meyrick's wife and only child had predeceased him, enabling a more generous disposition of his assets.[6] He had extensive property interests, in both North and South Wales. The family seat was in Ucheldre, Gwyddelwern, Merionethshire and Meyrick also owned several houses in Carmarthen.[7] In 1708, he set up a charity school in Carmarthen but for some reason directed in his will that the school and master should be moved to Bala, where it became the Bala Grammar School.[8] The will provided for an annual payment of £15 to the schoolmaster together with the use of the schoolhouse, and £15 per year for clothing for the students.[9]

His will, dated 25 March 1712, said: He left family property in Denbighshire and Merionethshire, as well as his Carmarthen property after expiration of some life interests, to the college to provide six scholarships of £10 and six exhibitions of £8. The scholarships and exhibitions were to be awarded to Jesus College students from North Wales, until they obtained their Master of Arts degree or were receiving more than £40 per year from a parish appointment. Any surplus was to be used to buy advowsons so that the College might present one of the scholars (or in default of a suitable scholar, a Meyrick exhibitioner or a North Wales fellow of the College) to a parish position.[10] Whilst the estate produced a surplus, only one living was purchased by the trustees, that of the rectory of Llandow in 1735. Further increases in the surplus led to an increase in payments to Bala School and to the scholars and exhibitioners, and to the purchase of other property in Cheltenham and Carmarthen.[11][12] This proved to be a profitable investment since, by 1840, the college had received more than £10,000 through the sale of trust land near Cheltenham for railway purposes. Payments to Bala School ended in 1862, when the annual payments were commuted for a lump-sum payment of £5,333.[13]

Meyrick scholarships and exhibitions are still awarded to students at Jesus College, based on academic merit. Students performing consistently at a first-class standard during the year in the opinion of their tutors may be awarded a Meyrick scholarship, with consistent performance at upper second to first-class standard potentially leading to the award of a Meyrick exhibition.[14] The restriction in Meyrick's bequest that the scholarships were for students from North Wales only was relaxed in 1857 to cover students from all of Wales and Monmouthshire.[15][16] The restrictions have been further relaxed and students who were not born in Wales are also now eligible for a Meyrick scholarship or exhibition if they are the child of a native of Wales, are able to speak Welsh or they were educated for the last three years of secondary school in Wales.[17]

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title: Edmund Meyrick

question: Describe Meyrick's relationship to Wales.

answer: He appears to have had strong ties to Wales. He attended schools there, was a clergyman there, and owned a house there.

critique: He is buried in Wales, which may be more indicative of the strength of the relationship to Wales.

critique: It is omitted that he was also a member of the Meyrick family.

critique: "He appears to have had strong ties to Wales" is not a very specific answer to the question. It would be better to rewrite the answer completely.

critique: Meyrick had extensive property interests in North and South Wales.

critique: He also held several positions in West Wales.

critique: The response misses to mention that he was also a benefactor of Jesus College, Oxford, where scholarships are still awarded in his name.

critique: It would help if it is stated that Meyrick was a clergyman based in West Wales.

critique: It should be pointed out that his most lucrative connections were in West Wales, not all of Wales

critique: Meyrick also received many lucrative positions in West Wales.

critique: He also seems to have had an extensive property portfolio in Wales.

critique: This is an accurate fact, but it does not show the extent of Meyrick's relationship to Wales.

critique: Meyrick was a clergyman in Wales, but the answer should mention that he was also a benefactor of Jesus College, Oxford.

critique: The response misses to mention that Meyrick was a Welsh cleric and benefactor of Jesus College, Oxford, where scholarships are still awarded in his name.

question: When did Meyrick live?

answer: 1636 to 1713

critique: The answer could be phrased as a complete sentence.

critique: The answer should give the dates in a proper format.

critique: He died in 1713, but this doesn't mean that he was born in 1636.

critique: The answer should be written in a full sentence.

critique: Include the month and year of Meyrick's death in the answer.

critique: It is omitted that he was born in 1636 and died in 1713.


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HI GOREGOUS

Many of you will be probably going on an amazing adventure this summer, flying to another continent, travelling with your friends or working in a different country. This post will be useful for those of you who will go on a long haul flight or for those who want to have a little spa time during your flight.

STEP 1 HAIRCARE

Let your hair down and put 5 drops of Aveda Dry Remedy on your hands and then run your hands through the hair massaging the product in. The Aveda oil is perfect for long haul flights as it consists of essential oils so it has also aromatherapy which will ensure you are relaxed and enjoy your flight. Tie your hair up so that it does not bother you during the spa routine.

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 STEP 2 REMOVE MAKE-UP

Remove your make- up with cleansing wipes or Bioderma. I chose the Yes To Cucumber wipes as they are easy to use and they are good for normal and sensitive skin so probably most of you will be able to use them. Also they are 95% natural so should not cause any irritation, plus the packaging is very handy as you can easily open it and close it without the wipes drying up.

STEP 2 REFRESH YOUR SKIN

After I remove my make-up I like to spray my face with the L'Occitane Essential Water to refresh my skin and prepare it for the face mask. You can spray it directly on your face and neck and then pat try with your hands or spray it on a cotton pad and then apply it on your face.

STEP 4 FACE MASK

How many times have you left the plane and felt like your skin is dry, looks disgusting and needs a facial? If I travel even for 3 hours I get this feeling so this part of the routine is crucial as it moisturises the skin, creates a protective layer between your skin and the airplane air which as you know is not always fresh and great for skin. The face mask I chose is a clear, moisturising mask from Lancome, so that it is not an embarrassment to keep it on :) This mask is infused with Botanical Extracts and it is intensely hydrating, leaving the skin looking plump and healthy.

I learnt this from Lisa Eldridge who applies a thin layer of the mask first and massages it in, and if your skin is dehydrated the mask will sink in. Then you would apply another layer so that the mask is continuously working on your skin.

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 STEP 5 EYES

If you went partying the night before, look tired or just want to diminish your eye bags, I would recommend using the Clinique All About Eyes Cream. Apply it around the eyes to get rid of any puffiness, dark circles or lines. You can reapply during the flight.

STEP 6 HAND CARE

Obviously you need to moisturise your hands. I suggest taking a small hand cream, I got one from L'Occitane with a gift set, and as you all know almond is my favourite scent and it is also firming so perfect for dry, tired looking skin.

STEP 7 LIPS

Remember to keep your lips moisturised during the flight <3 Use any moisturising lip balm or vaseline.

STEP 8 REPEAT

If the flight is very long reapply the mask, lip balm, hand cream and the hair cream so that you get the most out of your flight and leave the plane looking like a celebrity *-*

STEP 9 SLEEP + RELAX

If it is a long flight you should also enjoy yourself, relax and sleep so that when you land you look fresh and rested. Watch a movie you wanted to watch for a while, listen to music or read a magazine. This is your time to enjoy yourself and relax, you don't need to do anything...

STEP 10 CLEANSE + MOISTURISE

When you are close to landing, start removing the products from your face. The best product to use would be something like Clarins One Step Cleanser or Bioderma. Soak a cotton pad with it, and then remove the mask from your face. You can spray your face with L'Occitane Essential Water and remove it with a cotton pad as well. Follow up with a sample size moisturiser which will act as a perfect base for your make-up.

STEP 11 MAKE-UP

Reapply your make-up before landing so that you feel good, I would go for a natural look as your skin will look stunning so powder foundation, concealer and mascara will look perfect on your skin.

STEP 12 LANDING

You look perfect, your skin looks fresh and plumped up! You look rested, glamorous and definitely ready for holiday, adventure or work. Be careful of all the attention though ;)

_Ania's advice:_

_1. Don't be afraid to do your beauty routine on a plane_

_2. Use every opportunity to take care of your skin_

_3. Always look 10 years younger *-*_

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Ania

Labels: AVEDA, bbloggers, beauty, clarins, clinique, dry remedy, face mask, haircare, hydration, L'Occitane, lancome, Long haul flights beauty routine, skincare, yes to cucumbers

question: Summarize the author's advice.

answer: The author advises her fans to put on a clear moisturizing mask while they're on the plane. They suggest going over every part of their face. This includes the areas around their eyes as well as their lips. They also advise spraying their face with an infused water to get a hydrating glow.

critique: The author is not advising her fans to put on a clear moisturizing mask.

critique: The answer should mention the other steps.

critique: The response misses to mention that the author also advises to moisturize their hands and lips.

critique: The author doesn't suggest going over every part of the face.

critique: The author does not advise her fans to go over every part of their face.

question: What does the article say about anti-aging creams?

answer: No answer

critique: The article does not mention anti-aging creams.

critique: The response misses to mention that there is no specific mention of anti-aging creams in the article.


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Muffled voices filled my ears as I slowly started to slip into consciousness. I felt my legs strapped tightly to what I could only assume to be a chair. My hands were bound behind my back, my movements completely restricted. "Are you sure we should keep him here? Don't you remember what he is capable of? Especially with what you've done to him," said an unknown voice accusingly.

My eyes snapped open as I heard a coarse and familiar voice but I could only see a faint light, something was covering my head. "Of course I am. There's no way he can take all of us on though." It was at this point that I grew aware of the rustling of a number of bodies around me. Where am I?

The item covering my head was removed, and as my eyes adjusted to the light, I counted 18 bodies. They must think I'm pretty dangerous, I thought to myself as a smirk took form across my face.

"Well, well, well. It has been a while since we've seen each other, hasn't it Mr. Toigo," said the familiar voice with a smile. Why do I know that voice? I must have had a puzzled look to my face because he continued saying, “You don’t remember me, do you Mr. Toigo?” I shook my head, as I stared quizzically into his eyes. His grey eyes glared back at me with a look of resentment, yet his unshaven face held a devilish smile.

“Then maybe you’ll remember my brother…” A picture was thrown onto my lap from one of the burly men to my right. A tall lamp stood directly behind him, and as I looked around the room I noticed it’s symmetrical design. Another lamp stood in the exact same spot to my left, just in its mirrored location. Four white walls surrounded the 18 burly bodies around the room. Two mahogany tables lie to either side approximately six feet away, and directly in front of me was the man with the familiar voice, sitting in a steel chair identical to my own. A single unmarked door stood behind him. I looked down at the picture to see a man I remembered instantly, and this recognition transported me to the past.

My wife, with her beautiful brown hair and stunning figure, sat in the chair across from me as we waited for our names to be called, so that we could collect our beverages from the barista. “I’ve got an order for To-ee-go,” the barista exclaimed. I stood and picked up the hot tea and coffee my wife and I ordered. “It’s toy-go, but thank you,” I laughed as I left him a tip.

“Why do they always get it wrong hun?” my wife asked with a giggle. I held the door for her as we exited the coffee shop. The city was busy, pedestrians walking every which way, and we stopped for a second before entering the onslaught of people. As we walked we consumed our drinks and slowly made our way back to my parents house to return to the family reunion they were holding.

My eye caught those of a man in a grey hoodie and dark blue jeans before he entered into the alley just ahead of us. I moved my wife to the opposite side, away from the alley. As we passed by, there seemed to be a sudden lull in the people surrounding us. The hooded man appeared and pulled out a gun. I felt my wife’s hand suddenly jolt away from mine as another man grabbed her and held a knife to her neck. We were being jumped.

The first man directed the gun towards my head. “Don’t make this more difficult then it has to be, Mr. Toigo,” he stated with the same coarse voice as his brother. How did he know my name? “Release my wife, and I’ll do what you wish,” I said calmly. “Oh! So this is Mrs. Toigo?” he stated as he nonchalantly walked towards her, still aiming the pistol at me. “Let her go, now,” I said, my voice growing more tense.

“Is that attitude in your voice?” Our fellow pedestrians engorged us in a circle about 40 feet in diameter, too afraid to move closer. He pointed the gun at my wife, and she gave a slight exhale of exasperation. My body stiffened with anger at the thought of somebody threatening my wife, my fists clenching in rage. “Let her go now you son of a bitch,” my voice stern and forceful.

“I don’t think I wi-“ was all he managed to get out before I grabbed his shirt and threw him into the alleyway. The gun clanged against the ground as it fell out of his hands. The man holding my wife just stood in shock as I threw my fist into his jaw, breaking it instantly. As he lie writhing in pain on the cement, I stomped my boot into his throat. “Run!” I barked to my wife. She obliged and made a mad dash into the crowd.

The man I threw into the alley had regained his footing, and charged at me as he drew a knife from inside his jacket. As he slashed diagonally at me, I brought my forearm to his, abruptly stopping its progress. In one quick movement, I threw my entire body up under his arm, flipping his body over mine and directly onto the ground. I jumped on top of him and began punching furiously, blood splattering with each point of contact. He lifted his pelvis into the air, knocking me off balance as he simultaneously drove the knife into my thigh.

I grunted as it entered my leg, but I still managed to regain my balance, and tear the knife from my thigh before throwing it across the sidewalk. I raised to my feet and grabbed the breast of his hoodie, seizing him into the air, leaving his feet dangling inches from the ground. I back-peddled into the alley, before quickly spinning and launching the man into the nearby dumpster.

I backed into a parking meter as I watched the man attempt to regain his footing, before stumbling back onto the ground. I looked at his companion who was still unconscious. I heard a gasp from the crowd and my eyes darted back to my attacker as he aimed and fired his pistol. I felt the bullet enter my abdomen, but instead of toppling over in pain, I merely yelled as I felt an extreme amount of adrenaline course through my body. My body seemed to react on its own, turning towards the parking meter. With super-human strength I ripped it from the ground and threw it like a javelin directly at the man’s chest. I heard bones crack and saw blood spew from his mouth, but I wasn’t finished with him yet. He attempted to crawl away, but to no avail, as I walked towards him, my veins pulsing with adrenaline. My hands grasped the parking meter as I brought it down upon his back. Both his spine and the parking meter shattered and I could all but see him struggling just to stay alive, but he threatened my wife. I wasn’t done with him yet.

I threw away my weapon, and flipped my attacker over so that his anterior faced me. My hand grabbed his face, and I lifted him into the air easily with my newfound strength. His face expressed that he was clearly struggling just to breath, but I just said with a forceful tone, “I warned you, you son of a bitch.” With all of my strength I smashed his head into the wall, and upon impact I felt his skull crush in my hands. He was gone.

“Yes I remember your brother,” I said to the man after the flashback ended.

title: Adrenaline

question: What made the assailant attack Mrs. Toigo?

answer: Unknown.

critique: The answer is not unknown. The assailant was after Mr. Toigo.

question: Summarize why the kidnapper brought so many people to secure the narrator?

answer: No answer


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BERNARD NEWMAN (18 November 1903 – 30 November 1966) was the head designer for Bergdorf Goodman and head costume designer for RKO Pictures. He designed costumes for some 35 movies, including costumes for Ginger Rogers, Katharine Hepburn, Lucille Ball and Helen Broderick. He was posthumously included in the Costume Designers Guild Hall of Fame in 2004.[1]

Biography

Bernard Newman was born in Joplin, Missouri in 1903.[2] He studied in Paris and at the Art Student's League. He started working at Bergdorf Goodman, a luxury goods department store in Manhattan, as a window dresser.[3] He later became the head designer for Bergdorf Goodman,[4] and his clothes were worn by film stars like Kay Francis.[5]

Bernard Newman started working as costume designer in the film industry from 1933 on, working mainly for RKO Pictures for the next three years. Newman is best remembered for the costumes he designed for Ginger Rogers in movies like _Top Hat_ and _Swing Time_.[6][7] He made a blue dress with ostrich feathers, to Rogers's specification, which she wore in the _Cheek to Cheek_ sequence and which gave her the nickname of _Feathers_.[8][9] 15 of his costumes for the 1935 movie _Roberta_ were reproduced and merchandised by the Modern Merchandising Bureau.[10] Other films he worked on include _Sylvia Scarlett_ with Katharine Hepburn and _You Can't Take It with You_.[11]

Filmography

-   1933: _Rafter Romance_
-   1935: _Roberta_
-   1935: _Star of Midnight_
-   1935: _Break of Hearts_
-   1935: _The Nitwits_
-   1935: _Top Hat_
-   1935: _I Dream Too Much_
-   1935: _In Person_
-   1935: _Sylvia Scarlet_
-   1935: _The Lady Consents_
-   1935: _Two in the Dark_
-   1935: _Follow the Fleet_
-   1936: _The Witness Chair_
-   1936: _The Bride Walks Out_
-   1936: _Swing Time_
-   1936: _Walking on Air_
-   1936: _Adventure in Manhattan_
-   1936: _Smartest Girl in Town_
-   1936: _Theodora Goes Wild_
-   1936: _More Than a Secretary_
-   1936: _History Is Made at Night_
-   1937: _When You're In Love_
-   1937: _Vivacious Lady_
-   1938: _You Can't Take It with You_
-   1939: _Green Hell_
-   1942: _Tales of Manhattan_
-   1946: _Deception_
-   1946: _Humoresque_
-   1947: _Possessed_
-   1947: _Deep Valley_
-   1947: _Dark Passage_
-   1947: _Escape Me Never_
-   1947: _Hazard_
-   1947: _The Woman in White_

Notes

[1] Costume Designers Guild 2004 Hall of Fame

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[4] [https://books.google.com/books?id=Vpzp0rtDYCsC&pg=PA67&dq=%22bernard+newman%22&lr=&as_brr=3&ei=ukQHSNePCafSigG5zN2ADA&sig=afn52nrmoQl1zhLcyPikT7rtvYk#PPA67,M1 Sarah Berry in _Screen style: Fashion and femininity in 1930s Hollywood_] page 15 (2000)

[5] [https://books.google.com/books?id=QWRWZu2EsKAC&pg=PA155&dq=%22bernard+newman%22&lr=&as_brr=3&ei=FXYISNCUA5W2ygSt8_iNAQ&sig=xqo_xF4FKv8m45CEh22reF7LhAM Lynn Kear and John Rossman in _Kay Francis: A Passionate Life and Career_] page 155 (2006)

[6] Gregory Votolato in _American Design in the Twentieth Century: Personality and Performance_ page 45 (1995)

[7]  notes that John Harkrider designed the _Swing Time_ Silver Sandal Set (“Never Gonna Dance”) and the costumes used both on that set and on the “Bogangles of Harlem” set

[8] Turner Classic Movies on _Top Hat_

[9]  Rogers: “I designed the dress and I was going to wear it!”

[10] [https://books.google.com/books?id=Vpzp0rtDYCsC&pg=PA67&dq=%22bernard+newman%22&lr=&as_brr=3&ei=ukQHSNePCafSigG5zN2ADA&sig=afn52nrmoQl1zhLcyPikT7rtvYk#PPA67,M1 Sarah Berry in _Screen style: Fashion and femininity in 1930s Hollywood_] page 67-68 (2000)

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title: Bernard Newman (designer)

question: What does the text say about the qualities of a good costume designer?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the text does not say anything about the qualities of a good costume designer.

critique: It is mentioned that the costumes should harmonise with the character and the film set.

critique: The answer should mention that the text doesn't say anything about the qualities of a good costume designer.

question: What does the text say about Bernard Newman's life before Hollywood?

answer: Bernard Newman was born in Joplin, Missouri in 1903. He studied in Paris and at the Art Student's League. He started working at Bergdorf Goodman, a luxury goods department store in Manhattan, as a window dresser.

critique: The answer should mention that Newman was a costume designer before he was a window dresser.