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JOHN OF FALKENBERG or JOHANNES FALKENBERG (born in Falkenberg, Pomerania, date unknown; died about 1418 in Italy — or, according to other accounts, in his native town) was a German Dominican theologian and writer.

His prominence in medieval history is due partly to the share he took in the Western Schism, but chiefly to his involving himself in the long-standing disputes between the Teutonic Knights of Prussia on one side and the allied Kingdom of Poland and Grand Duchy of Lithuania on the other. He is known as one of the first thinkers to advocate genocide of another nation.[1]

Life

Little is known about his early life, save that he entered the Order of St. Dominic and spent his novitiate in the convent at Kammin. The fact that he was a master in Sacred Theology indicates that for a number of years he taught philosophy and theology in his order.

In opposition to many of his brethren and the general of his order, Bernard de Datis, who were firm adherents of the antipopes Alexander V and John XXIII, Falkenberg was an adherent of Pope Gregory XII. He carried his opposition so far as to refuse publicly in the Council of Constance to acknowledge Bernard as his superior.

Works

In the conflict between the Teutonic Knights on the one side, and Polish King Jogaila and Lithuanian Duke Vytautas on the other, Falkenberg supported the Knights, who waged a 100-year crusade against the pagan Grand Duchy of Lithuania.

At the time both sides submitted the dispute for mediation to the Council of Constance.

Falkenberg wrote a book, _Liber de doctrina_, published 1416,[2] opposing Polish scholar Paulus Vladimiri. _Liber de doctrina_ argued that the King of Poland and his adherents were idolators, and unbelievers; that the opposition against them was noble and praiseworthy. In _Liber de doctrina_ Falkenberg justified the tyrannicide advocated by the Franciscan Jean Petit. Falkenberg concluded that it was lawful to kill the King of Poland and his associates.[3]

Falkenberg also argued, in _Liber de doctrina_, that “the Emperor has the right to slay even peaceful infidels simply because they are pagans (...). The Poles deserve death for defending infidels, and should be exterminated even more than the infidels; they should be deprived of their sovereignty and reduced to slavery.”[4] Stanislaus F. Belch in his work _Paulus Vladimiri and his Doctrine concerning International Law and Politics_ wrote that he was the first writer to formulate justification of genocide.[5]

Falkenberg also published _Satira_ in 1412, further attacking the Poles and King Jogaila. At this time King Jogaila was Christian, as was Lithuania. Falkenberg called King Jogaila a “mad dog,” unworthy to be king.[6] In a later work _Tres tractatuli_,[7] published in 1416[8] Falkenberg attempted to refute Jean Gerson, Pierre d'Ailly, and other doctors of the University of Paris, who had condemned the works of Jean Petit. In this work, moreover, he denied the bishops the right to declare his book or any part of it heretical, claiming that in matters of faith the pope and general councils alone are infallible.

By order of Nicolaus, Archbishop of Gnesen, Falkenberg was imprisoned. The Poles demanded the conviction of Falkenberg for heresy, but in vain. His works were condemned by the Council of Constance as scandalously libelous, but not heretical.[9] A similar verdict was given by the Dominican Order, assembled at Strasbourg from May to June 1417, which also condemned the author to life imprisonment. On his return to Rome, Pope Martin V took Falkenberg with him, and kept him for several years in close confinement. Whether he eventually regained his liberty or died there is uncertain.

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[2] http://www.geschichtsquellen.de/repOpus_02225.html

[3] Schroeder cites: Giovanni Domenico Mansi, “Conc.” XXVII, 765.

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[7] Schroeder states: “Given as appendix to the works of Jean Gerson in the edition of Dupin, V, 1013-32.”

[8] http://www.geschichtsquellen.de/repOpus_02228.html

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title: John of Falkenberg

question: Summarize John of Falkenberg's viewpoints.

answer: He thought that the Polish King and his associates were unbelievers who should be deprived of their sovereignty and reduced to slavery. He also thought that the Emperor has the right to slay peaceful infidels.

critique: The answer omits that Falkenberg thought the Poles deserved death for defending infidels and should be exterminated.

question: What does the article say about John of Falkenberg's relationship with religion?

answer: John of Falkenberg was a German Dominican theologian and writer. He was an adherent of Pope Gregory XII. He wrote a book, Liber de doctrina, which argued that the King of Poland and his adherents were idolators, and unbelievers. He justified the tyrannicide advocated by the Franciscan Jean Petit. He also argued that the Emperor has the right to slay peaceful infidels simply because they are pagans.

critique: The answer should include that Falkenberg's works were condemned by the Council of Constance as scandalously libelous, but not heretical.

critique: The answer should mention that Falkenberg's works were condemned by the Council of Constance as scandalously libelous, but not heretical.

question: What does the article say about John's personal life?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer standardizes its requests for information; the article does not.

critique: The answer should mention that the article does not mention anything about John's personal life.

critique: The answer should state that the article does not mention anything about John's personal life.


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I had an interesting experience once. About 5 years ago, when I was still cleaning pools, I got the call to clean a pool in some mansion in a really rich area of the city I live in.

So I drove up there that Thursday morning. It was a very hot day, as we were in the middle of summer, and it was torture having to clean these pools when all I wanted to do was just swim in them. So I get to the right address, park my van, and then walk up to the door. I ring the bell and I get no response. I ring it twice. I ring it three times. Finally I hear someone call out "Coming", and so I take a step back to admire the house while I'm waiting.
Gosh it was a rich house. The flipping front door was made out of mohagony.

My thoughts are interrupted as I hear the front door open. I step forward, out of the sun, so that I can see who I'm working for today.

Wow. I still remember the feeling of being speechless, as if my tongue had been swallowed by my own throat. Standing before was a woman. Not just any old or ugly woman. NO. This one was a babe. She was wearing those short shorts that just hugged her butt, and showing off her long smooth legs. Above her butt she was wearing a shirt that had been tied up so that it was exposing a midriff, her tanned tummy looking firm and sexy. And above her hot tummy? Woah, very good looking breasts that were being shown enough that you could get a good look at them, but concealing enough so that some was still left up to the imagination.
To top it all off, her face. With hair as black as a moonless night, and eyes as blue as the pearly ocean, I felt like I could stare at her for an eternity. She seemed like she was some goddess, and here I was staring at her.

"Hello?..."
My thoughts are interrupted as she speaks, making me realise that I'd been staring.
"Yes. Hello. My name is John Smith and I'm here to clean the pool." I said while reaching out for a handshake.
"Brilliant" She grasped my hand in a firm handshake. "Please come in and I'll let you get to work."
"Thanks"

She showed me to the pool, and then went back into the mansion she probably called home as I started cleaning. Half an hour passed without a single sight of her, even though I was definitely keeping my eye out on her. Half an hour turned into an hour. Still no sign. And then, I heard a sliding door roll back. And there she was. Dressed just as before, except for that she was wearing a pair of black sunglasses that framed her face and complemented her dark hair beautifully. In her hand she appeared to be carrying what looked like a bottle of suntan lotion. Intrigued, I kept on working, but making sure that I could always see her out of the corner of my eye.
She proceeded to sit down on a beach chair that was close to the pool, and started to apply suntan lotion all over her gorgeous figure. I could barely concentrate on my work as this gorgeous woman rubbed that lotion over her legs than her midriff than shoulders and finally face. I felt my body respond, and my pants grew tighter as a boner began to grow. She seemed to be having trouble getting lotion onto her back though. She tried several times to rub it in, but each time she failed.

It was at this time I was started to sincerely contemplate going over there and offering to help her. My mind waged back and forth, part of me already tired and just wanting to get back home. However the choice ended up not being mine
"Excuse me" I heard.
I turned, hoping that she was talking to me.
"Hi John. I was wondering if you could just help me for a sec, rub this suntan lotion on my back?" she said, reaching my ears as a beautiful melody.
"Sure" I called back, setting my equipment down as I walked over to where she was lying down.
"The bottle of suntan lotion is just next to my chair, if you could please rub it in on my back" she cooed, while taking off her shirt, exposing a black bra beneath it. She layed down on the chair, face first so that I could rub it into her back. But I wasn't looking at her back. I was looking at her butt. Her glorious, firm butt that was just every slightly poking out, inviting me to grab each cheek in my hands.

"John?" she asked
"Sorry" I mumbled as I quickly squirted some lotion into my hands "Just had some diffuculty with the bottle"
"Haha" she softly chuckled "Sure you were"
Not knowing what to say to that as a response, I just got straight into applying the lotion onto her back. My hands caressed her body, rubbing it into every bit of open skin that I could find. I was so glad that I had taken that massaging course years ago...I knew it would pay off one day.

Minutes passed and I just kept going. What started out as a simple application of suntan lotion turned into a lenghty massage. I started to feel her become responsive to my touch. A slight squirm there and little sigh of pleasure here. I could tell that I was beginning to make her aroused. Not wanting to waste this once of lifetime opportunity, I decided that I'd take it a bit further. I began to massage the bottom of her feet, then up to her ankles. From there I worked up to the knees and from there to the thighs. Her skin was so soft to the touch, her legs so tanned and sexy, that I felt my boner grow even bigger. My head began to swim with the arousement that was beginning to a hold of me. But I didn't stop.

My massaging hands explored ever further up her legs, until I reached her upper thigh, just where her short shorts came to a stop. As I kept massaging, I could hear that she was trying to stifle her sighs and groans of pleasure as my hands did their job. Suddenly, not being able to take resist the enticement of her arousal any longer, she quickly sat up.

My heart sank. I had come so close, only to what seemed to be rejected. However I was wrong. She leaned forward and enveloped my lips in her lips, my mouth in her mouth. Our tongues touched and danced with one another as we kissed one another with a desperation that only seperated lovers could know. I broke the kiss to get a breath of fresh air. My heart raced with adrenaline. And as we looked into one another's eyes, it became too much, and we resumed kissing one another. My lips left hers, and trailed down her body, softly carressing her neck, then her shoulders, and finally the breasts. Her breathing quickened as she started to moan my name. "John.... John... John" she gasped breathlessly "Thank you. Thank you so much.."

"Your welcome" I whispered in her ear "Get rea-"
She raised her finger to my lips, silencing me with a single action.
"Thank you" she said "for getting me horney for when my husband comes home. He will be so happy with me." She stood up, and smiled at me. "Maybe next time" she uttered. And with that she walked across the coutyard and back into the house, closing the sliding door behind her.

title: The Pool Man and the House Wife

question: Summarize the twist ending.

answer: The story seems to be building towards a romantic moment between John and his client. Instead of allowing John to get further, the woman deflects his advances and thanks him for the massage before walking away. The twist ending is revealed to the reader: she had called the pool cleaner over to get herself horny for her husband.

critique: The response contains inaccurate information.

critique: The answer omits that the woman is married.

critique: The woman's motivation is not to get herself horny for her husband.

critique: The last sentence is unnecessary for the answer.

critique: The response is missing the part where the woman kisses John and then tells him that she was only getting horny for her husband.

question: Summarize the escalation of the narrator's interactions with the woman.

answer: The narrator is initially hired to clean the pool. He is then asked to rub suntan lotion on the woman's back. The narrator massages her thighs, and she kisses him. The narrator kisses her breasts, and she kisses him again.

critique: The response misses to mention that the woman then thanks the narrator for getting her horny for her husband, and that she walks away.

critique: The response misses to mention that the woman kisses the narrator and then asks him to leave.

critique: The response could include more details about the escalation of the narrator's interactions with the woman.

critique: The response misses to mention that the woman kisses the narrator again and then thanks him for getting her horny for her husband.

critique: The response is missing the part where the woman thanks the narrator for making her horny for her husband.

critique: The response omits that the woman ultimately rejects the narrator's advances, thanking him for getting her horny for her husband while promising an encore some other time.

critique: The response misses to mention that the woman kisses him again and then thanks him for getting her horny for her husband.

critique: The response misses to mention that the woman then thanks the narrator for getting her horny for her husband.

text: The story doesn't include the narrator kissing the woman's breasts.

category: accuracy

question: What does the story say about the pool man's home life?

answer: No answer

critique: The response misses to mention that the pool man's home life is not discussed.

critique: The response misses to provide an answer to the task.

question: What is the pool man's motivation?

answer: He seems to be motivated by the idea of sex.

critique: It's omitted that he's motivated by the thought of having sex with the woman.

critique: The answer should mention that the pool man is motivated by the opportunity to have sex with the housewife.

critique: The answer should be more specific about what the pool man wants.

critique: It is omitted that he is motivated by the housewife's arousal.

critique: "He seems to be motivated by the idea of sex." - this is too vague because there was no mention of an idea. Remove "seems to" and replace with the more specific "is"


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The last two days had been very strange for me. I killed a man on a psycho’s lawn, and the next day, the psycho came into my office and asked if I would like to eat lunch with him. He seemed to be acting perfectly normal. I noticed his speech pattern had changed as well. He wasn’t saying “ya” or swearing anymore. Something was off. Or maybe Noah had just realized how messed what we had done was.
I put it out of my mind, and started to enjoy myself. Noah was actually very intelligent and funny. He must have been intelligent from the start, I concluded, he is a lawyer after all. He was probably just drunk for the last week. I chuckled at the thought.
We finished up our lunch, and headed out to my car. Noah said he had left his phone at my office, so I offered to take him there before I took him home. He thanked me in an uncharacteristically gratuitous way. However, I didn’t sense anything was amiss, and we got in.
Big mistake. The minute I got in the car, Noah pulled out what looked like an ingot, and bashed me across the head with it.
I woke up in a small, cramped room that I recognized as the interior of Noah’s shed.
“Took you long enough,” said Noah in a cold voice. “What the fuck?” I demanded.
“I can’t have another murderer taking advantage of Noah, now can I,” he said in that cold voice, “No, I’m going to have to kill you I suppose.”
“What? No! Noah, you don’t have to do this. I’m not going to tell anybody, you can let me go.” I knew he wasn’t going to.
“Noah’s not here right now. If you’d like to leave a message, please don’t. I screen his calls.”
Noah had finally snapped. The bastard was crazy.
I tried to reason with him, “C’mon Noah. You know you don’t have to do this!”
“I TOLD YOU I’M NOT NOAH!”
“If you’re not Noah, who are you then?”
“BELLUA.”
No. It couldn’t be. Noah had talked about Bellua so much, but always acted as Bellua was a friend or something. I finally put the pieces together.
“Yes, I can see the truth has finally dawned on you,” Noah/Bellua drawled, “Frankly, I don’t see how an idiot like you became a neurosurgeon. Let me explain it to you. I’m the original Noah. The Noah you know is simply a second personality of mine. Noah was born after I was caught in an explosion. That’s why he is so fixated on fire. I’ve been this way for as long as I can remember, but now that I have the Other Noah, it is so much easier for me to cleanse this disgusting society. The Other Noah agrees. He doesn’t have my capacity, so he uses fire as his tool. It’s crude but it works. Why, just recently he managed to rid society of a bartender who was a serial rapist. I’m much more dedicated however. I take out the real sickos. Like you. And Other Noah will dispose of your body. You pretend to kill only bad people, but what about the little girl who you kidnapped and did unspeakable things to? What about the man you decapitated for fun? ANSWER ME? Why’d did you do it? Did you have any reason? NO! I may be a monster, but I know that! People like you, who pretend to be infallible, make me sick!”
My cheeks were so cold. I couldn’t believe it. How did he know all this?
I knew I was going to die. I began to say an Our Father.
“YES. This reaction. I love it!” Noah/Bellua bellowed, “The ‘prayer,’ as if pretending to repent to an entity you’ve never believed in will make it all better. Using religion as a fair-weather friendship with God, I love it! But why bother praying to God now? I control your life now: I am your God. Pray to me!”
I said nothing. Noah/Bellua began to pace, muttering something under his breath.
“What?” I said.
“Squares!” He murmured a little louder,
I realized what he was doing: getting ready to kill me. Finally, I closed my eyes, went limp,  and gave up.
But he wouldn’t let me do that. He yanked up into a sitting position forcefully, and suddenly I felt metal being pressed down, then a sharp pain in the back of my neck. He wouldn’t stop. It felt like he was cutting something out. When he finished, he showed me what he had done. The square piece of my skin he had cut out was dripping with my blood.
“And now, I must bid you adieu,” Noah/Bellua whispered into my ear. And all was dark.

title: Bellua (Original Short Story by Me) p.3 Rust (Final Part)

question: Why does Bellua hate the narrator so much?

answer: The narrator killed a man on Noah's lawn.

critique: The answer should mention the narrator's other crimes.

text: Because the narrator pretends to kill only bad people, but he kidnapped and did unspeakable things to a girl and decapitated a man for fun. People like the narrator that pretend to be infallible, make Bellua sick.

category: coverage


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PRINCE TALAL BIN MUHAMMAD (born 26 July 1965) is a member of the Jordanian royal family. He is the eldest son of Prince Muhammad bin Talal, the brother of King Hussein Talal of Jordan, and first cousin of the current King Abdullah; this makes him 15th in the line of succession to the Jordanian throne. He has one brother, Prince Ghazi (b. 1966).[1]

Biography

Prince Talal's early education took place in Jordan, and from 1975 to 1983 he attended Harrow School in the United Kingdom.[2] In September 1983 he entered the Royal Military Academy Sandhurst in the United Kingdom, and upon passing in April 1984 was commissioned as a 2nd Lieutenant in the Jordan Arab Army.[3] After a few months in the Jordanian Army, he entered the School of Foreign Service of Georgetown University, Washington DC in September 1984. He completed the five-year joint degree Bachelor of Science in Foreign Service – Master of Science in Foreign Service (BSFS-MSFS) program, concentrating in International Politics for his BS Degree and US Foreign Policy and Diplomacy for his MS Degree.[4]

After undergoing further military training the US and the UK, Talal returned to the Jordanian Armed Forces, where he served as a Company Commander in a Special Forces battalion from March 1990 until March 1991. On 25 March 1991, he was appointed as Military Secretary to King Hussein. In this capacity he functioned as a personal aide to the King, taking the minutes of his meetings and accompanying him daily on his activities within Jordan and his official trips abroad. These duties expanded to charge of the King's political correspondence and speech writing – Prince Talal co-authored King Hussein's speech before a Joint Session of the US Congress marking the end of a State of War between Jordan and Israel in July 1994. Talal was further entrusted by King Hussein with intelligence liaison activities and confidential political missions.[5]

In addition to this, Prince Talal was appointed by King Hussein as his Personal Representative in the United States in February 1992 – a position he held until the death of King Hussein in February 1999. This involved enhancing relations with the US Administration, Government and Congress following the Gulf War of 1991. Talal also advanced the King's official trips to the US, arranging his program and topics of discussion with US officials. He would then prepare his talking points, and remain behind in the US after each visit to follow up any outstanding issues. He was closely involved in securing the forgiveness of Jordan's $700 million debt to the US and the transfer of a squadron of F-16 fighter aircraft from the US to Jordan following the Washington Declaration of July 1994.

In August 1996, Prince Talal was appointed by King Hussein as Director of the National Security Council, with the task of establishing the National Security Council of Jordan. Amongst other things, he was responsible for the recruitment, training, and organization of the NSC Staff; the compilation of electronic data bases and Intelnet setup; coordination with the relevant government officials and bodies; intelligence liaison; producing and distributing a daily brief and in-depth studies; and compiling the Agenda for NSC meetings. Following the death of King Hussein, Prince Talal continued to hold this post until August 1999, when King Abdullah II appointed him as his National Security Advisor. He held this post until September 2001 when he was appointed Special Advisor to King Abdullah II.[6]

Personal life

In 1991, Prince Talal married Ghida Salaam, daughter of Hany Sala'am and Raja'a Arab. The couple live in Jordan with their three children: Prince Hussein (born 1999) and twins Princess Raja'a and Prince Muhammad (born 2001).

Education

1975–1983 The Harrow School in Harrow, London, England.

1983–1984 The Royal Military Academy Sandhurst, UK. (Standard Military Course No.34)

1984–1989 Edmund A. Walsh School of Foreign Service, Washington DC, USA. Five-year Bachelor of Science in Foreign Service-Master of Science in Foreign Service Joint Degree program BSFS Concentration: International Politics, Law and Organization. MSFS Concentration: US Foreign Policy and Diplomacy

1975–1978 St Edmund's School, UK

1973–1975 American Community School, Amman

1972–1973 Orthodox College, Amman

Career

-   Sept. 2001 – present

Special Advisor to King Abdullah II

-   Aug.1999-Sept.2001

National Security Advisor to King Abdullah II and Director of the National Security Council

-   Aug.1996-Aug.1999

Director of the National Security Council[7]

-   Feb.1992-Feb.1999

Personal Representative of King Hussein in the United States of America

-   Mar.1991-Aug.1996

Military Secretary of King Hussein

-   Mar.1990-Mar.1991

Officer Commanding, 2nd Company, 91st SpecialForces Battalion, Khaw, Jordan

-   Aug.1984-Mar.1990

Special Forces Brigade Headquarters

-   May–Aug. 1984

Deputy A-Team Leader, 1st Company, 101st Special Forces Battalion, Hashemiyyah, Jordan

Other activities

-   Sept. 2008 – present

Advisory Board Member, The James Martin 21st century School, Oxford University, UK

-   Feb.2001– March 2002

Chairman of the National Landmine Removal and Rehabilitation Commission, Jordan

-   Sept.1997 – present

Member of the Higher Committee of the Retired Servicemen and Veterans Association, Jordan

-   Sept.1998-Sept.2001

Chairman of the Board of Trustees, Mu’tah University, Kerak, Jordan

-   Sept.1998-Sept.2001

Member of the Committee of Higher Education, Jordan

Honours

National honours

-   : Grand Cordon of the Order of the Star of Jordan

-   : Grand Cordon of the Order of Independence

Foreign honours

-   : Knight Grand Cross of the Royal Norwegian Order of Merit (4.4.2000)

-   : Knight Grand Cross of the Royal Order of Isabella the Catholic (2.12.1994)[8]

Appointments

Military promotions

-   June 2009 Major-General
-   June 2002 Brigadier-General
-   May 1997 Colonel
-   June 1994 Lieutenant-Colonel
-   Nov.1992 Major
-   Nov.1989 Captain
-   Nov.1986 1st Lieutenant
-   Apr. 1984 Commissioned 2nd Lieutenant

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title: Prince Talal bin Muhammad

question: What does the text say about the cause of the State of War between Jordan and Israel?

answer: No answer

critique: The response misses to answer the instruction in the task.

critique: It is omitted that the text does not cover this information.

critique: The answer should mention that the text doesn't mention the cause of the State of War between Jordan and Israel.

critique: The response misses to answer the question in the task.

critique: The response misses to mention that the text does not provide information on the cause of the State of War between Jordan and Israel.

critique: This response is incorrect and needs to be re-written.

critique: The answer should mention that the text does not mention the cause of the State of War between Jordan and Israel.

question: What does the text say about Prince Talal bin Muhammad's place in the Jordanian Royal family?

answer: Prince Talal is the eldest son of Prince Muhammad bin Talal, the brother of King Hussein Talal of Jordan, and first cousin of the current King Abdullah. This makes him 15th in the line of succession to the Jordanian throne.

critique: The response should includeled, not led.

question: Summarize Prince Talal's military career.

answer: Prince Talal's military career began in 1984 when he was commissioned as a 2nd Lieutenant in the Jordan Arab Army. He then served as a Company Commander in a Special Forces battalion from March 1990 until March 1991. In 1991 he was appointed as Military Secretary to King Hussein. He was further entrusted by King Hussein with intelligence liaison activities and confidential political missions. In 1996 he was appointed by King Hussein as Director of the National Security Council, and in 1999 he was appointed National Security Advisor.

question: What does the text say about how close Prince Talal was with King Hussein?

answer: Prince Talal was a personal aide to King Hussein. He took the minutes of his meetings and accompanied him daily on his activities within Jordan and his official trips abroad. Prince Talal co-authored King Hussein's speech before a Joint Session of the US Congress marking the end of a State of War between Jordan and Israel in July 1994. Prince Talal was further entrusted by King Hussein with intelligence liaison activities and confidential political missions.

critique: It is omitted that Prince Talal was King Hussein's Personal Representative in the United States.

critique: The answer does not mention that Prince Talal was appointed by King Hussein as his Personal Representative in the United States in February 1992.

critique: The answer should mention that Prince Talal was appointed by King Hussein as his Personal Representative in the United States.

critique: The answer should mention that Prince Talal was appointed by King Hussein as his Personal Representative in the United States in February 1992.

critique: Prince Talal was a personal representative to King Hussein in the United States.

critique: The highlighted text doesn't explain the closeness between Prince Talal and King Hussein.

text: The answer could also mention that King Hussein was his paternal uncle.


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Stan Munro tinkers with a dragon skeleton Halloween display at 107 Sandra Dr., North Syracuse. Photo by Katrina Tulloch.

NORTH SYRACUSE -- When people see the elaborate Halloween displays on the property of Stan Munro and Suzi Campanaro, they often tell Munro, "You're lucky you have a wife who lets you do that."

How little they know about the creative couple.

"I say, 'Are you kidding me? She started it!'" said Munro, laughing. "Suzi's the one who pushes me to do it. She says, 'You know you always love it when the kids come by.'"

On Saturday, Munro and his buddy Tony Zelinsky of Brewerton finished building a gigantic dragon skeleton in the front yard of Munro and Campanaro's house at 107 Sandra Dr. in North Syracuse.

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Stan Munro, Suzi Campanaro and Tony Zelinsky created the dragon skeleton Halloween display at 107 Sandra Dr., North Syracuse. Photo by Katrina Tulloch.

The skeleton, made from hundreds of pieces of cheap particle board, wood paneling and Masonite hardboard, took about a week to complete.

"This year wasn't expensive at all; most of it is recycled wood from previous projects," Munro said. "We keep our costs down and labor is free. Tony gets paid in steak."

On Tuesday, Oct. 6, Munro wore a (human) skeleton T-shirt as he repainted black teeth onto the dragon's skull.

Gauzy porch screens drape the wing bones and catch the light as the sun goes down. A 14-bone rib cage, tall enough to walk underneath, tapers down to a massive tail which extends around the entire lawn and wraps around a tree.

"If we're going to make a dragon, we might as well use the whole yard," Munro said.

At least 1,000 trick-or-treaters visit the couple's house each year. In 2007, police had to block off Sandra Drive because so many people came to see the display.

"The neighbors love it, I think, or they're lying to me," Munro said. "We try to keep it quiet, but one year we had a ghost disco and played disco music every night. [The neighbors] may have gone a little crazy that year."

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A DECADE OF HALLOWEEN HOOPLA

The tradition began in 2005, when the couple built a giant spider with human cocoons on their roof. In the last decade, they've created a different scene nearly every year.

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Stan Munro's "Evolution of Execution" display for Halloween 2006.

In 2006, they made a "History of Execution" display, with a working gas chamber and exhibits of lethal injection, hanging, an electric chair and 15-foot-tall guillotine.

"That kind of bordered on disturbing, but it was all for fun," Munro said.

In 2007, the couple's giant spaceship drew the attention of a North Syracuse code inspector, who issued Munro a ticket because he thought they were building a gazebo on their front lawn.

"Once we explained it wasn't permanent, everything was fine," Munro said at the time.

The smoking, flying saucer "wreckage" and its dead alien pilot cost Munro close to $1,000. The dead alien was $400, but Munro says it's "still a member of our family."

He also created a ghost disco (2008), Death Star gas station with Darth Vader (2013) and zombie family (2014), all of which are featured on halloweenlawn.com.

Munro is known around Central New York as the toothpick engineer behind the extravagant Toothpick City displays at the Milton J. Rubenstein Museum of Science and Technology and the New York State Fair.

His toothpicking has been featured in Ripley's Believe It or Not museums in Orlando, Fla. and Branson, Mo.

"These [dragon bones] are just giant toothpicks to me," Munro said.

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question: What does the text say about Munro's Halloween displays from years past?

answer: Munro's Halloween displays span a decade and almost all of them feature various scenes, monsters, and creatures. The giant dragon skeleton was Munro's most expensive so far, having cost close to $1000. In 2007, Munro's spaceship received a ticket from the code inspector because he thought they were building a gazebo. Munro says most of the materials he uses are re cycled.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: The response inaccurately mentions that Munro's Halloween displays span a decade.

text: "The giant dragon skeleton was Munro's most expensive so far, having cost close to $1000." - this is incorrect. The dragon display wasn't expensive at all because Munro used recycled wood from previous products. The $1,000 he spent was on the "wrecked" alien spaceship in 2007.

question: What does the text say about Munro's Halloween display this year?

answer: Munro and his buddy Tony Zelinsky of Brewerton finished building a gigantic dragon skeleton in the front yard of Munro and Campanaro's house at 107 Sandra Dr. in North Syracuse. The skeleton, made from hundreds of pieces of cheap particle board, wood paneling, and Masonite hardboard, took about a week to complete. The skeleton is 14-bone rib cage, tall enough to walk underneath, tapers down to a massive tail which extends around the entire lawn and wraps around a tree.

critique: "At least 1,000 trick-or-treaters visit the couple's house each year. In 2007, police had to block off Sandra Drive because so many people came to see the display." is evidence of the popularity of Munro's Halloween display. This should be included in the response.

critique: The answer should mention that the display is a dragon.

critique: It's omitted that at least 1,000 trick-or-treaters visit the couple's house each year.

critique: The answer should mention that the display is a dragon skeleton.

critique: The answer should mention the 1,000 trick-or-treaters that visit the couple's house each year.

critique: The text does not enumerate the dragon bones their massive tail.

question: What does the text say about how Munro's family and neighbors feel about his Halloween displays?

answer: Stan and Suzi are a creative couple who love to celebrate the holiday, but their neighbors and even Munro's wife claim that Suzi is the one who pushes him to do the elaborate displays and that he always loves it when the kids come by. Munro's neighbors love the displays his family creates and he believes they're just being kind when they say it. The police had to block off Sandra Drive because of how many people visited the Munro and Campanaro's house in 2007.

critique: The answer should mention the neighbors' reaction to the ghost disco.

critique: The police did not block off Sandra Drive because of the Munro and Campanaro's house.

critique: The statement of how Munro's wife begins the process is made up.

text: "but their neighbors and even Munro's wife claim that Suzi is the one who pushes him to do the elaborate displays and that he always loves it when the kids come by. Munro's neighbors love the displays his family creates and he believes they're just being kind when they say it" - there are inaccuracies in this response. The neighbors don't claim that Suzi is the one pushing Munro to make the displays. Suzi is Munro's wife (or partner). Munro doesn't believe his neighbors are just being kind by saying they love his creations - he is just being modest.

question: What does the text say about Tony Zelinsky's family?

answer: No answer

critique: The text does not mention anything about Tony's family.


text:
PLEASE VISIT OUR JEWISH ABOLITION MOVEMENT SECTION, WHERE YOU CAN FIND RESOURCES AND OTHER INFORMATION, INCLUDING SERMONS, AND THE EXCELLENT WORK UNDERTAKEN BY THE DEATH PENALTY ACTION GROUP.

YOU CAN FIND THIS SECTION HERE:

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_"WE SHOULD FIGHT AGAINST THE DEATH PENALTY 100%, REGARDLESS OF THE CRIME – THAT IS MY BELIEF, AND HAS ALWAYS BEEN MY BELIEF." RANDY E HALPRIN_

DEAR VISITOR,

We welcome you to this site with open arms!

We would firstly like to invite you to visit our 'RANDY'S CASE' section where you will find a full and frank outline of Randy's case, and our 'CAMPAIGN' section where we will post updates and information as and when we can.

We would like to make it clear from the outset that Randy does NOT have access to the internet, or to a computer. This is NOT a fan site or a forum in which to ask for legal or financial support, and all decisions and posts regarding this site are made solely by Randy's close friends.

Over the 16 years Randy has been on death row, many people have visited his website to keep up with his life and how his appeals are progressing. We realise that since his execution date was issued last year, we now have many, many more visitors to the site and we would like to welcome all of you, and thank you for your support. As you will already know, Randy received a Stay of Execution on 4th October, 2019, and we are now entering a new phase in our fight.

As well as fighting for Randy's life, the purpose of our work on this website is to bring your attention to Randy's life, as we believe that he deserves another chance. The facts in Randy's case fully support our belief that he is NOT a killer, and should NOT be executed. There is a wealth of information on this website relating to Randy, his life, and his case; and in reading about his life as it is now - through his own personal writings - we hope you will come to the same conclusion and share his story with other people.

We realise that some of you will enter Randy's world cynically, and perhaps even condemningly...However, what you will read on this website is a true reflection of the person Randy is today. Reading through his journals and memoirs will show the reader that Randy is not only aware of the mistakes he has made in his life, but that he also takes responsibility for those mistakes - it would be very difficult to fake the type of growth we have seen blossom in Randy, over the last decade or so of his writings.

In Randy's _Memoirs_ (which you can read under the 'MEMOIRS' tab) he has told the story of his youth in great detail...For years, Randy has expressed to his friends his wish to 'give back' in some way, and in telling his story very openly, he hopes that this will help parents to recognise the warning signs that their children are struggling, and also help young people to not end up on the same road as he did. During the time that Randy wrote his _Memoirs_ he went through a very tough roller-coaster of emotions, but with the support and encouragement of his loved ones, he made it to the end.

We ultimately hope that you will leave this site with a clearer understanding of the death penalty and how it's applied. For further information, we have posted a list of links to various organisations with whom you can get involved, and lend your support. You can find this list under the 'NEWS' tab. We believe that life on death row should NOT be kept hidden from society, and should be openly talked about if change is to happen. For this reason, our work with Randy aims to educate and inform those who visit our website.

As you delve further into this website, please ask yourselves the following question...

_"Are any of us exactly the same person we were 20 years ago?"_

We hope you will come back and visit for more updates/developments in Randy's case, or, if you would like to get in touch, you can reach us at our email address: friendsofrandyhalprin@gmail.com.

We thank you for taking the time to read about Randy.

THE FRIENDS OF RANDY E. HALPRIN

question: What does the text say about Randy on death row?

answer: Randy has been on death row for 16 years. He was scheduled to be executed on October 4th, 2019. Randy received a Stay of Execution, which means his execution has been postponed.

critique: "Randy" should be capitalized (sentence case)

critique: It's omitted that Randy is not a killer and should not be executed.

critique: The answer omits the purpose of the website.

critique: This is more about his stay of execution than being on death row.

critique: The answer should mention that he is not a killer.

text: The answer should mention that the authors of the website claim that Randy is innocent.


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CONCORD ACADEMY, formerly named CONCORD FIRST ASSEMBLY ACADEMY (CFA ACADEMY, styled as “cfa Academy”) and FIRST ASSEMBLY CHRISTIAN SCHOOL, is a private college preparatory Christian school in Concord, North Carolina. It was founded in 1976 as a part of the ministry of First Assembly Worship Center (now Multiply Church[1]). Continuing a close relationship with its home church, First Assembly Christian School became known as CFA Academy in 2013 and then Concord Academy in 2020. It offers pre-school daycare through 12th grade, with about 700 students.

In 2014, 120 churches were represented within the student body. The students come from surrounding cities such as Concord, Kannapolis, and Charlotte, and neighboring counties including Cabarrus, Rowan, Iredell, Mecklenburg, Stanly and Union County.

Curriculum

CFA Academy uses a variety of curricula to comprise its academics, including A Beka, Bob Jones, Saxon, Rosetta Stone, Cengage, Houghton Mifflin, Glencoe, and Prentice Hall. In the high school, a college-preparatory curriculum is taught in the traditional classroom setting under the leadership of certified teachers. High school students are required to take 4 units of English, 4 units of mathematics, 4 units of Bible, 3 units of science, 3 units of social sciences, 1 unit each of health/PE and computer, and 3 units of electives for a total of 23 units for graduation. Advanced Placement and honors classes are also available for students. CFA Academy students regularly score above state and national averages on achievement and college entrance tests.

Class of 2013 graduates were accepted to several prestigious universities, including Duke University, the University of North Carolina at Chapel Hill, Wake Forest University, University of Virginia, and Georgia Tech.

Campus

The school was located at Rockland Circle in the 1970s, though the Worship Center was relocated to its present location in 1978. The Educational Center was not completed until 1988, and the school was relocated to its present location in 1989. The current campus is home to separate elementary and high school buildings, a gymnasium, living center, worship center. 'Up the hill' is where the church, daycare, living center and lower school (K4-8th) is all located. The upper part has 3 floors. The first has a cafeteria, chorus room, reception room, an updated theater room, and a weight lifting room. On the second floor is where the daycare, chapel, a brand new café, band room, music room, and all of the elementary rooms. On the third floor there are the middle school rooms, science lab, resource center, and art rooms. The high school is located 'down the hill' on its own campus with two gymnasiums, performance stage, and a computer lab and science lab. The high school is capped around almost 300 students each year; and growing every year.

Fine arts

CFA Academy has middle and high school concert bands, a choral and drama department, and a visual art department. Students have competed in regional and national exhibitions, including the Northeast Medical Student Art Exhibit, Scholastics Art & Writing Awards, ACSI Art Shows, Band Competitions, All-County Band, All-District Band, All-State Band and the Blumey Awards.

Athletics

The sports teams of CFA Academy are called the Eagles. The school offers 12 varsity sports and also has junior varsity and middle school programs. The varsity boys basketball team has been particularly successful over some period of time, winning conference championships and state championships. The boys track team won the 2017 NCISAA 2A State Championship.

The school is a member of the North Carolina Independent Schools Athletic Association and the Metrolina Athletic Conference along with:

-   Gaston Day School – 2A
-   Northside Christian Academy – 2A
-   Gaston Christian School – 3A
-   Hickory Grove Baptist School – 3A
-   Metrolina Christian Academy – 3A
-   Southlake Christian Academy – 3A
-   Westminster Catawba Christian School – 2A[2]

CFA Academy has produced athletes that have gone on to play at NCAA Division I institutions such as Georgetown, San Francisco, Wake Forest, UAB, Toledo, UNC-Wilmington, Presbyterian, High Point, and UNC-Asheville, as well as various Division II and III and NAIA schools.

Notable alumni

-   Codi Miller-McIntyre, Adriatic League professional basketball player for KK Partizan
-   Rachel Reilly, contestant on _Big Brother 12_ in 2010 and winner of _Big Brother 13_ in 2011
-   Ish Smith, NBA professional basketball player for the Washington Wizards

Notes

Category:Christian schools in North Carolina Category:Schools in Cabarrus County, North Carolina Category:Private high schools in North Carolina Category:Private middle schools in North Carolina Category:Private elementary schools in North Carolina Category:Preparatory schools in North Carolina

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[2] NCISAA Membership Information

title: Concord Academy (North Carolina)

question: What does the story say about Concord Academy?

answer: Concord Academy is a private college preparatory Christian school in Concord, North Carolina. It was founded in 1976 as a part of the ministry of First Assembly Worship Center. It was renamed Concord Academy in 2020.

critique: The answer should mention the school's curriculum.

question: What does the story say about the curriculum in the CFA?

answer: CFA Academy uses a variety of curricula to comprise its academics, including A Beka, Bob Jones, Saxon, Rosetta Stone, Cengage, Houghton Mifflin, Glencoe, and Prentice Hall. In the high school, a college-preparatory curriculum is taught in the traditional classroom setting under the leadership of certified teachers. High school students are required to take 4 units of English, 4 units of mathematics, 4 units of Bible, 3 units of science, 3 units of social sciences, 1 unit each of health/PE and computer, and 3 units of electives for a total of 23 units for graduation. Advanced Placement and honors classes are also available for students. CFA Academy students regularly score above state and national averages on achievement and college entrance tests.

critique: It is irrelevant that CFA Academy uses a variety of curricula.

critique: The answer should mention the number of units required for graduation.

critique: The answer should mention that the curriculum is Christian.

critique: First line doesn't describe the content of the curriculum.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

question: What does the story say about the campus of CFA?

answer: The school was located at Rockland Circle in the 1970s. The Worship Center was relocated to its present location in 1978. The Educational Center was not completed until 1988, and the school was relocated to its present location in 1989. The current campus is home to separate elementary and high school buildings, a gymnasium, living center, worship center. The upper part has 3 floors. The first has a cafeteria, chorus room, reception room, an updated theater room, and a weight lifting room. On the second floor is where the daycare, chapel, a brand new café, band room, music room, and all of the elementary rooms. On the third floor there are the middle school rooms, science lab, resource center, and art rooms. The high school is located 'down the hill' on its own campus with two gymnasiums, performance stage, and a computer lab and science lab. The high school is capped around almost 300 students each year; and growing every year.

critique: The answer is too long and should be shortened.

critique: The answer is taken from the article, but it is unnecessary and should be omitted.

question: What does the text say about running a school?

answer: No answer

critique: This response is incorrect because the text does mention running a school.


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[250 px|right|thumb|Rice field after harvest (in Japan).]

The 2008 GLOBAL RICE CRISIS occurred between January and May 2008, the international trading price of rice jumped dramatically, increasing more than 300% (from USD $300 to $1,200 per ton) in just four months.[1] By December 2008, prices had decreased substantially, if not returned to previous levels, marking an end to the crisis.

Causes

While the rice crisis did occur at the same time as the 2007–2008 world food price crisis, Tom Slayton has argued the spike in rice prices are a special case.[2] Slayton argues that the price increases were a result of rising oil and petrochemical prices (peaking in July 2008); and export restrictions by a number of countries.[3] Trying to protect citizens from inflating rice prices due to growing oil costs, some national governments, namely India and Vietnam, began restricting export of rice.[4][5] Partly because of increasing wheat prices, the Indian government decided to increase the percentage of rice (over wheat) in its food distribution programs.[6] To help secure food security, India (the source of more than 10% of world rice trade) stopped all non-Basmati exports in October 2007, lifting the ban temporarily, then re-applying it in April 2008.[7] and some retailers began rationing sales, due to fears of insufficient global supplies of the grain. Vietnam, fearing shortages due to a cold wave on the Red River Delta in mid-January 2008, banned sales to international rice traders.[8] Both of these cases caused a steady increase in prices during the first months of 2008. Other countries, including Egypt and Pakistan,[9] as well as Brazil[10] followed by placing their own restrictions on rice exports, helping to drive up the price even further.

As the market prices rose, Thailand developed an idea for a new organization to regulate rice supplies and prices.[11] This new organization would've mirrored the system used in oil sales by the Organization for Petroleum Exporting Countries.[12] The proposal for the Organization of Rice Exporting Countries never flourished, but the idea scared markets, allowing rice prices to reach very high levels.[13]

In late April 2008, rice prices hit 24 cents a pound, twice the price that it was seven months earlier.[14]

Six years of drought in Australia's rice-growing regions may also have encouraged people to fear a reduction in global rice supplies, and helped cause the commensurate rise in global prices.[15]

Effects

While Japan, which produces enough rice for its domestic needs, maintained a constant pricing and no consumer concern, Countries in West Africa as well as the Philippines, dependent upon imports to provide the staple food of rice, were particularly hard hit by increasing prices.[16] Growing panic over retail prices in the Philippines spread across Asia. “People panicked everywhere,” according to economist Peter Timmer. “In Ho Chi Minh City, for heaven's sake, the center of the second-largest rice exporting surplus in the world, supermarkets and rice markets got cleaned out in two days.”[17]

On 15 April, the Philippines, the world's largest rice importer, urged China, Japan, and other key Asian nations, to convene an emergency meeting, especially taking issue with those countries' rice export bans. “Free trade should be flowing”, Philippine Agriculture Secretary Arthur Yap stated.[18] In late April 2008, the Philippines government requested that the World Bank exert pressure on rice exporting countries to end export restrictions.[19]

Asian rice consumers and agricultural commodity traders around the world had been aware of the problem for months, but it garnered widespread attention in the United States in the week beginning April 21, 2008 when a Costco Wholesale Corporation store in San Francisco, California limited rice purchases to five 20-pound bags per customer.[20] Later in the week, on April 23, the outlet reduced that number to two. Also on April 23, Wal-Mart division Sam's Club announced it would limit the sales of 20-lb. bags of long-grain rice to four per customer. Other sources stated that the limits were only placed on imported rice, and that non-imported medium- and short-grain rice remained in comparative abundance.[21]

Also on April 23, “Thai shipments of rice” to a major Canadian rice wholesaler, Western Mills, Ltd. abruptly ceased:

    _"“We've never seen anything like this in the history of this company,” said Lawry Poupart, controller at the company, which supplies major chains including Safeway and Save-On-Foods. “Everybody is precariously watching what's happening in the world.”_ [22]

Food Riots

Deadly riots over the rising price of food erupted in Haiti on April 4, 2008,[23] due primarily to a jump in the price of rice, “the main ingredient of the Haitian diet,”.[24] Six people were killed in the unrest, including a U.N. peacekeeping soldier on April 12, and the unrest subsided only when the nation's Prime Minister resigned and the government lowered the price for a bushel of rice.[25] These developments caused alarm in the highest levels of global economic analysis and planning.[26] [27]

Ending the crisis

While there was no physical shortage of rice, increasing prices created a panic that supplies could not match demand. This fear was lessened when the United States allowed Japan to export unsold American rice (stockpiled in Japan because of a World Trade Organization decision). As of 16 May, anticipation of the move had already lowered prices by 14% in a single week.[28] Although the rice from Japan was never actually sold or shipped, the world market price continued to fall every month of 2008 thereafter.[29]

[1] How Fear Drove World Rice Markets Insane, NPR, November 02, 2011

[2] Rice Crisis Forensics: How Asian Governments Carelessly Set the World Rice Market on Fire, Tom Slayton, Center for Global Development (CGD), Washington, DC.

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[5] “Vietnam and India move to limit rice exports” International Herald Tribune March 29, 2008

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[10] Brazil halts rice exports as world food prices climb

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[14] “Cyclone fuels rice price increase”, _BBC News_, 7 May 2008

[15] “A Drought in Australia, a Global Shortage of Rice”, New York Times, 17 April 2008.

[16] " Asian states feel rice pinch", BBC News, 11 April 2008.

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[18] “Manila calls for Asian summit over food crisis” , _The Standard_, 15 April 2008

[19] Al Jazeera 2008, 'Manila urges end to rice export ban' , _Al Jazeera English_, 29 April. Retrieved 29 April 2008.

[20] “Rice Shortage Roils San Francisco Stores, Markets, Food Banks”, Bloomberg, 25 April 2008.

[21] “Global rice squeeze hitting U.S. consumers”, San Francisco Chronicle 25 April 2008.

[22] “From Wal-Mart quotas to a 'frenzy' in Vancouver, Asia's rice crisis goes global” Canadian _The Globe and Mail_, April 24, 2008

[23] “Food riots turn deadly in Haiti” BBC news, April 5, 2008

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[25] “World food crisis hits home” (see timeline in the article) Seattle Post-Intelligencer, April 24, 2008

[26] “Crisis in Haiti as World Bank issues food price warning” “foodcrisis.wordpress.com” April 16, 2008.

[27] “The U.S. Role in Haiti's Food Riots” April 21, 2008. Bill Quigley via Counterpunch.org

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title: 2008 global rice crisis

question: What does the text say about how to cook rice?

answer: No answer

critique: The response misses to answer the instruction question.

question: What does the text say about the 2008 Global Rice Crisis?

answer: The 2008 Global Rice Crisis occurred between January and May 2008. The prices of rice for international trading skyrocketed, with the prices increasing about 300% i just four months. The cause of this rise in rice prices was due to export restrictions.

critique: The answer should mention the countries that were affected.

text: The answer should also mention the food riots.

question: How did the 2008 Global Rice Crisis happen?

answer: The 2008 Global Rice Crisis happened between January and May 2008. The international trading price of rice jumped dramatically, increasing more than 300% (from USD $300 to $1,200 per ton) in just four months.

critique: The answer does not mention the causes of the crisis.

critique: The response does not answer the question.


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The Maniac

By: Leah Pagano

Chapter 1: Introducing a maniac
Brett grew up in a small town in Pennsylvania. He went to church every Sunday and had a very loving family. But from the time he was a small boy he knew there was something different about him. He could always feel this rage inside of him waiting to burst out. He always held it in for fear of his parents sending him away to the looney bin. But one day when he was about thirteen years old, he stumbled upon a stray cat when he was walking home from school. Normally these cats were afraid of people, but not this one. He was very friendly. So Brett picked him up and took him home knowing his parents wouldn't be home for hours. This was the first time Brett would kill. He thought about it the whole way home. Every step he took the rage grew stronger. He started perspiring profusely. He finally hit the front door of his house but instead of going in he just stood there a few minutes. He turned and decided to go into the basement. He would remain down there for two hours. No sounds. No wails. Just a pool of blood spilling out from under the door. Brett had just unlocked his rage. The worst was yet to come.
	He had just figured out the way to control his rage. Killing. He knew it was wrong but he figured it was just animals so it was okay. What he didn’t realize was that he was slowly turning into a monster. Day after day he slaughtered these poor animals and each day he became stronger, more violent. His fits of rage lasted longer and longer until he finally snapped. This was it. Today would be the day he took it one step further.
Chapter 2: It’s only A Crime If You Get Caught
	He waited patiently outside the grocery store day after day looking, hoping to find The One. The One that would set him free. The One that would finally unlock his brain and let him be normal. Or so he thought inside his twisted head. He saw little girls, little boys and their parents. He decided it would be an adult. Someone bigger than him so he could feel faster, stronger and smarter than them. He knew it would be hard to get them alone. So he went home and thought about his plan. In the middle of the night it came to him. Act like he was lost and ask for a ride. No one would leave a little boy stranded would they? His plan would be put into action Friday night. His parents would be gone for the weekend and no one would be around to interrupt his deadly deeds.
	He waited anxiously through the whole week for Friday to finally arrive. When the day came he quickly packed up his backpack and got on his bike to head to the grocery store. He walked in and saw that the store manager was working the evening shift and would be leaving around midnight. He thought this was the perfect opportunity.
	He waited in the bushes until the manager was walking towards her car. He waited until she had the key in the door and then jumped out, hit her in the head with a rock and then he dragged her body into the bushes. He only lived a few blocks from the store so he knew he had to move in the darkness to not be seen. He slowly and carefully moved the body step by step through yards and driveways. He had left the basement door open for easy access. He quickly threw the body down the steps, closed the door and locked it behind him. What madness lies in store for the night shift manager? Only Brett knew and he was about to unleash a whole new kind of evil.
Chapter 3: In The Torture Chamber
	A few hours passed and there was a lot of clinks and clanks during this time. The manager started to open her eyes. She didn't know where she was. Brett had a mask on his face just in case she would escape. He didn't want to be incriminated for his crime. He walked up to her and saw her name tag. It said Ashley. He looked into her eyes and he could see she was weak. She opened her mouth to speak but then realized she was tied up and gagged. Before she could process all this Brett slammed a white hot brand into her side. With this Ashley screamed and her eyes filled with tears. Brett took great pleasure in this. After all, he was just beginning. He seared her flesh over and over again with the brand before she passed out again. He then moved onto phase two of his plan.
	He grabbed his fathers nail gun. He put Ashley's hands and feet flat against the table and then woke her up with smelling salts. Just as her eyes opened he pulled the trigger on the nail gun and shot a nail into her right hand. He followed the same pattern with the rest of her limbs. He couldn't stand it anymore. He had to end it. He was too pumped to handle anymore. He grabbed a bucket, put it underneath the table and turned around. He returned with a butcher knife. He took his mask off. He told Ashley he wanted her to know what her murderer looked like. And with that, he slit her throat. She was dead in minutes. Now what to do with the body? This had already been planned out as well.
Chapter 4: The Master Plan
	Brett watched as the last few drops of blood left Ashley's body. He was so proud of himself. He finally got all the rage out. He felt “normal”. Now what to do? Get rid of the body of course. He got out his dads saw and began the slow process of hacking her body to pieces. He boiled them up and put them into mason jars. He buried the blood in the backyard. You may ask, what happened to the pieces of her body? Well Brett was slowly feeding his dog Milo the pieces little by little in his dog food. He thought he had committed the perfect crime. How would anyone ever find out. Three months had past and everything was going fine. Brett only had a few pieces left to feed Milo and it would be over forever. That is, until Milo got sick. He begged his dad not to take him to the vet. He said he just had an upset stomach for a few days. But his dad took him anyway. And that's when the truth finally came out. When they x-rayed Milo's stomach they saw all of Ashley's fingernails in there. Brett's dad had no idea what happened. Brett told him he didn't know how they got there. But the vet called the police after they had left and told them what had happened. A few hours later the police arrived at Brett's house with the surveillance tapes from the grocery store. They had seen everything Brett had done until he reached the neighbors yard. Brett ran out of the house as fast as he could. The police said when they caught him he would go to trial for murder. They found the blood in the backyard and the few pieces left of Ashley down in the deep freeze. Brett was done for and he knew it. How long could he avoid the police?
Chapter 5: The Death Of A Maniac
	Brett ran for what seemed like hours. Had it been worth it? All the years of rage finally gone only to go to jail for the rest of his life. No way. He stayed hidden for a few days before the police finally caught up with him. They pulled him out of his hiding space and put handcuffs on him. He went to trial, was found guilty, and sent to a maximum security prison. His first night in he couldn't stand it. He waited until everyone had gone to sleep and the guards were busy bringing in a new prisoner. He tied his bed sheets into a noose and hung himself. By the time the guards found him it was too late. Brett killed himself at age eighteen. Two months shy of graduating and starting his life for real. His parents grieved for him. Ashley's family was happy to have justice served. So this brings us to the end of the story. Or does it? It turns out Brett's girlfriend had just found out she was pregnant a few weeks before he was caught. Will his child have the same mental problems? Will he be a maniac like his father? Or would he live a normal, peaceful life like everyone else? We may never know. Or will we?

title: The Maniac

question: What does the text say about the cat?

answer: Brett was thirteen years old when he found a stray cat that was friendly. He took it home and killed it in the basement. He thought about it the whole way home. He killed it because he was angry and wanted to get rid of his rage.

critique: The answer should mention that Brett killed the cat to release his rage.

text: The answer should mention that it was Brett’s first time to kill.

question: What does the text say about Brett's first time killing a person?

answer: Brett killed Ashley, the night shift manager of the grocery store. He hit her in the head with a rock and dragged her body into the bushes. He then took her to his basement and tortured her. Brett killed Ashley by slitting her throat.

critique: The answer omits Brett's plan to kill his victim. Brett had been following Ashley around and planned to ask her for a ride home, which would give him a chance to kill her.

critique: The answer should mention that Brett killed Ashley because he was a maniac.

critique: "Brett killed Ashley, the night shift manager of the grocery store." - this is incorrect. Brett killed Ashley, the night shift manager of the grocery store.

critique: The answer should mention that Brett was caught.

question: What does the text say about how it was found out that Brett murdered Ashley?

answer: Brett fed pieces of Ashley's body to Milo up until one day, Milo was taken to the vet so he could get treatment for a stomach upset. The vet took an x-ray of Milo and found Ashley's fingernails still in his stomach. At that point, Brett's dad reported him, and he was sure he would probably go to jail.

critique: Milo was x-rayed and that showed up the fingernails. The vet simply called the police. There was no direct link made.

critique: The vet did not take an x-ray of Milo. It was the police who took the x-ray because the vet called them.

critique: The vet didn't take an x-ray of Milo. The vet called the police after they had left.

critique: The vet did not take Milo to the vet for treatment. Brett's dad took Milo to the vet because Milo was sick.

critique: The vet did not take an x-ray of Milo. The vet called the police after the x-ray.

text: Brett’s dad did not report Brett. It was the vet who reported the incident to the police.


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_' Báetán mac Muirchertaig_' (died 572),[1] also BAETÁN BRÍGE, was an Irish king who is included in some lists as a High King of Ireland. He was the son of Muirchertach mac Muiredaig (died 534), also considered a high king.[2] He was a member of the Cenél nEógain branch of the northern Uí Néill. He ruled in Ailech from 566 to 572.[3]

The high kingship of Ireland rotated between the Cenél nEógain and Cenél Conaill branches in the late 6th century.[4] Báetán ruled jointly with his nephew Eochaid mac Domnaill (died 572) from 569.[5] The middle Irish king lists have misplaced their reign putting it earlier than the annalistic tradition but other king lists have them in the correct order.[6] They are also omitted from the earliest list of Kings of Tara, the _Baile Chuind_ (The Ecstasy of Conn), a late 7th-century Irish poem. It is possible that the Ulaid king, Báetán mac Cairill (died 579), was the actual high king at this time.[7]

In 572 the two kings were defeated and slain by Crónán mac Tigernaig, king of the Cianachta Glenn Geimin in modern County Londonderry.[8]

Báetán's son Colmán Rímid also appears as high king of Ireland in some lists. He had four other sons, Máel Umai, Forannán, Fergus and Ailill. His sons are given in _The Laud Genealogies and Tribal Histories_ (ZCP Vol 8, P.294 Kuno Meyer) as follows: “Coic maic Baetáin maic Muirc[h]ertaig .i. Forgus, otáit Cenél Forgusa; Forannán, a quo Hui Forannáin; Ailill .i. athair Cindfaelad; Maelhumai .i. in rígfénid; Colman Rimid athair Fína máthar Flainn.” The Annals of the Four Masters at 615.2 state, “Ailill, son of Baedan; Maelduin, son of Fearghus, son of Baedan; and Diucolla, were slain in Magh Slecht, in the province of Connaught. They were of the race of Baedan, son of Muircheartach.”

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Notes

[1] all dates per _The Chronology of the Irish Annals_, Daniel P. McCarthy

[2] T.M. Charles-Edwards, _Early Christian Ireland_, Appendix V

[3] he is given a reign of 6 years in the _Laud Synchronisms_

[4] Charles-Edwards, pg.494-495

[5] they are given a reign of three years in the _Book of Leinster_ and one year in the _Laud Synchronisms_.

[6] Charles-Edwards, pg.484-487

[7] Francis J.Byrne, _Irish Kings and High-Kings_, pg.114

[8] _Annals of Ulster_ AU 572.1; _Annals of Tigernach_ AT 571.1

title: Báetán mac Muirchertaig

question: What does the story say about Báetán mac Muirchertaig?

answer: Báetán mac Muirchertaig was an Irish king who is included in some lists as High King of Ireland.

critique: Mention that he was the son of Muirchertach mac Muiredaig.

critique: Does not mention his father, who was also considered a high king.

question: What does the article say about Báetán's wife?

answer: No answer

critique: The question is asking for something that is not in the article.

critique: He had two, and their names were Móana and Urlachtai.

critique: The article does not mention Báetán's wife.

critique: It is omitted that there is no mention of Báetán's wife.


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11th January 2016 is a day many will never forget for it saw the passing of a true music legend in David Bowie. Simon Pegg commented that: _“If you’re sad today, just remember the world is over 4 billion years old and you somehow managed to exist at the same time as David Bowie.”_ He was a man who reinvented himself countless times and remained relevant and inspirational as a musician and artist across decades.

Peter Gabriel said that: “_He was a one-off, a brilliant outlier, always exploring, challenging and inspiring anyone who wanted to push the boundaries of music, art, fashion and society. There are so few artists who can touch a generation as he did, we will miss him badly.”_

I quote Peter Gabriel, as his words about Bowie are words that can be readily applied to an astounding teacher. I have written before about the loss of maverick eccentric teachers, who inspired generations of students, and am reminded again their ilk by the fact that they were always _“EXPLORING, CHALLENGING AND INSPIRING.”_ We all had teachers who did the same. Perhaps it was not in the fields of music and the arts but in science, mathematics or geography. But when we look bask wispily at our school days, we rarely remember what we were taught, but we always remember those who taught us!

In an interview with Russell Harty in 1975, Bowie explained what characterised a great show. His words resonate with the educator in me and I began to think of how his description of the key ingredients of a concert is very similar to the characteristics of an astounding lesson! I deliberately use the word astounding, given the fact that it is the word Bowie used himself and especially to avoid using the word “outstanding” given its OFSTED connotations for UK teachers.

_“THE IMPACT TO THE SHOW HAS TO BE THE ASTOUNDING THING, NOT THE DRESSING OF IT. __THE D__RESSING UP THE SHOW IS JUST A DRESSING AS A PERFUNCTORY KIND OF THING._ _THE CONTENT HAS TO ASTOUND. Y__OU CAN DRESS A SHOW WITH A TRILLION DOLLARS, OR TRILLION POUNDS, WORTH OF GOODIES BUT IF SHOW IS NOT A SUBSTANTIAL THERE WILL BE NO IMPACT.”_

Just as Bowie was a “Starman” it takes a teacher of exceptional ability to engage and inspire students truly. If we are honest, the recipe for an astounding lesson is to a degree intangible. As much as OFSTED, HMI, District Inspectors and the alike want to try to describe, and even quantify “outstanding”, sometimes it is beyond explanation. Sometimes like a Bowie concert, or a Picasso masterpiece or Lionel Messi goal, it is beyond mere words. Sometimes you have to see it to believe it! Having said that the words of Bowie do paint a picture of the essential components of astounding pedagogy. Truly extraordinary educators appreciate that quality education is not about “smoke and mirrors” or the dressing up of a learning experience. These elements of a lesson are as Bowie, in the context of one of his shows, said “perfunctory.” The critical component is that the content has to astound!

In recent times it seems discussion around the importance of content in education has been missing with debate has primarily focused on pedagogy and practice. However, as much as a Bowie show was unforgettable, partially due to the peripheral aspects, his genius was underpinned by his music. He was a brilliant songwriter and musician. His content was the key to his success. Bowie planned his lessons – he wrote his own songs!

As we mourn the passing of a legend we should seek to learn from his genius. Bowie was a craftsman of screen, stage, art and fashion and we in education can be the craftsmen in our classrooms.

question: Summarize how the text characterizes David Bowie and his influence on popular culture around the world.

answer: David Bowie was the epitome of a "reinvention of oneself" and remained relevant in music and art throughout his life. His work had a great impact on generations of musicians and artists. Bowie said that the "impact to the show has to be the astounding thing, not the dressing of it." He also said that "content has to astound." Bowie was a brilliant songwriter and musician with a unique sense of style.

critique: The answer should mention the author's thoughts on Bowie's influence on education.

critique: The answer should mention that Bowie was a "Starman".

critique: The answer should mention that Bowie was a one-off, a brilliant outlier, always exploring, challenging, and inspiring anyone who wanted to push the boundaries of music, art, fashion, and society.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: It is omitted that he died on January 11, 2016.

question: Describe the effect Bowie's passing has had on pop culture.

answer: No answer

critique: The passage describes the impact Bowie's passing had on pop culture.

critique: The passage does mention the effect Bowie's passing had on pop culture.

critique: The input explicitly states that Bowie's passing had an effect on pop culture.

critique: While an accurate reflection of the question, it is also an answer many would already know as a critic who expressed the origins of today's response. The question asks for the reaction to Bowie's passing, not the reason for it. Replace the answer choice with the actual reason for Bowie's literal absence from the world.

critique: The passage mentions that Bowie's passing has had a big impact on pop culture.

critique: The passage mentions the effect Bowie's passing had on pop culture.

text: The answer should state that the article does not describe the effect of Bowie's passing on pop culture. Instead, it talks about Bowie's influence on pop culture while alive.

category: coherence

question: Summarize the theme of this article.

answer: The theme of this article is the importance of content in education. The author is using the passing of David Bowie as a way to discuss the importance of content in education. The author states that it is the content that matters and that content is what will leave a lasting impression on students. The author goes on to say that it is not about "smoke and mirrors" or the dressing up of a learning experience. The author also states that Bowie planned his lessons, he wrote his own songs.

critique: The author is not directly tying the theme of content to Bowie, but to Bowie's legacy of astounding content.

critique: The author is not discussing the importance of content in education. They are discussing the importance of content in education.

critique: The theme of the article is the similarity between Bowie's approach to his shows and the approach of an astounding teacher.

critique: The author is not using Bowie's passing to discuss the importance of content in education.

critique: It is redundant to say the author states here. Delete this statement.

question: Summarize what the author maintains is David Bowie's strongest point.

answer: The author maintains that Bowie's strongest point was his music. He was a brilliant songwriter and musician. The author says that Bowie's genius was underpinned by his music.

critique: The author does not say that Bowie's strongest point was his music. The author says Bowie's strongest point was his content.

critique: The author does not say that Bowie's strongest point was his music.

critique: The author doesn't say that Bowie's strongest point was his music, but that his strongest point was his content.

critique: The author also says that Bowie is a craftsman in screen, stage, art, and fashion.

critique: The author doesn't say that Bowie's strongest point was his music.

critique: The author says that Bowie's genius was underpinned by his music, but it's not the strongest point.


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ROBERT GORDON MARTYN (August 15, 1930 – December 2, 2015) was a right fielder in Major League Baseball who played for the Kansas City Athletics in parts of three seasons spanning 1957–1959. Listed at 6' 0", 176 lb., Martyn batted left-handed and threw right-handed. He was born in Weiser, Idaho.

College career

Martin was an alumnus of Linfield College, where his father Bernard Martyn, aunt Lillian Turner Millsap and uncle Bill Turner also attended. Martin's first year at Linfield was 1948, and e attended the college not only because much of his family went there, but also because it was affiliated with the Baptist church he went to.

Although Martin played shortstop at high school in Twin Falls, Idaho, his baseball coach Henry Lever immediately changed his position to outfielder. Martyn once said of the change, “That was probably a major break for my future.”

Additionally, Martyn was selected a Northwest Conference All-Star in three consecutive seasons from 1950 to 1952, while helping lead the Linfield Wildcats to conference championship victories in 1950 and 1951.

Academically, Martyn double-majored in mathematics and sociology and he graduated cum laude. While playing professional baseball, he earned his masters degree in education in 1959, studying between seasons.

In 2000, Martyn was elected to the Linfield College Athletics Hall of Fame. His father, Bernard Martyn was elected in 1999. They are one of two father-son combinations in the Linfield College Athletics Hall of Fame.[1]

Playing career

Minor Leagues

Originally signed by the New York Yankees in 1952, Martyn debuted on July 4 of that year and went 5-for-6 for the Class-C Boise Yankees.

In a seven-season career, Martyn hit .298 with 48 home runs and 117 runs batted in in 671 games. He also was named to three All-Star teams while in the minors. In the 1956 American Association All-Star Game, he hit two home runs and earned Most Valuable Player honors.

Major Leagues

On June 15, 1957, the Yankees traded Martyn along Woodie Held, Billy Martin and Ralph Terry to the Athletics in the same transaction that brought Ryne Duren, Jim Pisoni and Harry Simpson to New York.

Just three days after the trade, Martyn made his big league debut facing the Washington Senators. He appeared at right field and went 1–4 with a walk in his first big game.

He finished the season with an average of .267 (35-for-131)

Overall, Martyn hit .267 (35-for-131) with one home run and 12 RBI in 58 game appearances. The following year, he appeared in 95 games and batted .261 (59-for-226) with two homers and 23 RBI, ending sixth in the American League with seven triples and ninth with five intentional walks.

Martyn was used sparingly after that, appearing as a pinch hitter for Bob Grim in 1959. He grounded out and never appeared in a major league game again. On April 12, 1959, he was traded back to the Yankees along with Mike Baxes in exchange for Tom Carroll and Russ Snyder.

In a three-season career, he hit .263 (94-for-358) with three home runs and 35 RBI, including 35 runs scored, 12 doubles, 11 triples and two stolen bases in 154 games.

Later years

After his professional baseball career ended in 1960, Martyn worked for Tektronix for 23 years. He served twice on the Linfield Alumni Board and was president in 1973.

Martyn died in 2015 in Pacific City, Oregon at the age of 85.[2]

Sources

[1] Linfield College Athletics

[2] Obituary

title: Bob Martyn

question: Summarize everything relating to education.

answer: Martin attended Linfield College, where his father, aunt, and uncle also attended. He double-majored in mathematics and sociology and graduated cum laude. He earned his master's degree in education while playing professional baseball.

question: What does the text say about Martyn's baseball career ending?

answer: Martyn's baseball career ended in 1960. He was traded back to the Yankees in exchange for Tom Carroll and Russ Snyder. He grounded out and never appeared in a major league game again.

critique: Martyn was traded back to the Yankees after he grounded out.

critique: The answer should mention that he grounded out as a pinch hitter.

critique: "He grounded out and never appeared in a major league game again" is irrelevant.

critique: The answer should mention that Martyn was traded to the Yankees after his career ended.

critique: The answer should mention that he grounded out in a game.

critique: The answer should mention that he grounded out in his last game.

critique: The answer is a run-on sentence and should be split into two sentences.

question: What does the text say about home runs?

answer: At the start of his career, Martyn hit 48 home runs. He played 2682 games and had 259 career home runs. In the 1956 American Association All-Star Game, he hit two home runs and earned Most Valuable Player honors.

critique: The answer is incorrect. Martyn hit 48 home runs in his 7-season career. He hit two home runs in the 1956 American Association All-Star Game.

critique: The response contains inaccurate information.

critique: The article doesn't mention the number of games Martyn played in.

critique:
Martyn played a total of 671 games and hit 48 home runs. His average "per season" for home runs was only 7, so it's implausible that he had 259 in a career.
His average "per season" for home runs in the 1956 American Association All-Star Game was 2, so Martyn did not hit two in the game.

In both the Minor and Major Leagues, he hit no more than 7 home runs, while his record was 7 in 1956.

He only 1 home run in the Major Leagues against Washington.  There is no mention that he became Most Valuable Player as stated in the article or in any of Martyn's records.

Because the text is extremely clear, something is very wrong in the answer because Martyn only had 3 at the time of his death.
This answer is completely wrong.

critique: There is no evidence in the text that Martyn played 2682 games.

critique: Martyn hit 48 home runs in his 7-season minor league career, not in his 3-season major league career.

critique: Martyn hit 48 home runs in his 7 season career.

text: The response should mention Martyn's major league home runs.

question: What does the text say about Martyn's marriage?

answer: No answer

critique: The text does not mention anything about Martyn's marriage.

critique: There is no information about Martyn's marriage.

critique: The text does not say anything about Martyn's marriage.

critique: The answer should mention that there is no information about Martyn's marriage.


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Damn. Now I really didn't see this happening. Of all the things to happen at this bland school and this is the shit that happens. Wow. I guess I'm getting a bit carried, let me start from the beginning.
          My school, Jefferson Middle School, is rather boring, nothing really exciting happens here except the occasional girl drama that usally goes like, "Brian likes me! Not you, skany hoe!" And ends in a matter of three days. I'm usually quiet, if you were to call me "popular girl," you would be wrong but calling me a "nerd" wouldn't be right either. I was just sort of there. I had my friends and that's all I needed. That's where this story starts. With my friend, Daniel. Daniel was a pretty intresting boy. All acceralted classes, loved video games and comics, and wasn't bad looking at all. Over the first year of middle school, Daniel and I became pretty close. Hanging out after school and learning about eachother. It was pretty nice. Daniel loved life and he wasn't afraid to show it. If he had something to say, oh would he say it, but he was never disrespectful about it. He was always being a gentlemen. People always said shit about him.
         "Oh! Did you hear about Daniel? I heard he was sucking cock in the bathroom!"
         "Daniel the fag!"
         "Daniel should go burn in fucking hell with all the other fags that enjoy buttsex!" Get the trend here? They kept on saying he was gay, over and over. Through messages on Facebook, notes, or even writing on bathroom walls, which is very cliche. There have been times where I have asked if he was gay and I would get the same answer every time.
          "Do you think I am?" Over and over, he never changed it. Daniel was really proud and he felt as if he shouldn't state if he were gay or not and I really admire that about him. 8th grade started and I assumed that the gay jokes would have gotten old by now, but they didn't. They actual got worse. More people started calling him a "fag, dick-sucker," and spreading rumors that I don't even wanna remember. I noticed a change in Daniel, he wasn't as outgoing, didn't speak his mind, became less quite, less proud. I tried helping him, I really did but it never worked. He seemed to just become more depressed. Those kids never noticed either, they just attacked him more and more, getting more ruthless with each insult. This drama was lasting way more than three days and I wasn't sure what would happen. Shit even got worsed.
          That's when I heard the intercom come on one day during class.
       "Students, I am sad to announce that our student, Daniel Rigsbee, has died yesterday." They didn't tell us how he died, but we all knew. He killed himself. The voice of the principal announcing his death was so fucking emotionless, it made it seem as if Daniel was some character in a movie that died. Everyone was silent. I was filled with anger. Those ruthless bastards did this. They didn't know when to stop. The minute the bell rang, I sprinted to his house asking if it was true was they said today. His father simply nodded and beckoned me in. He said that there was a note left in his room directed to me and "bitches." I walked to his room, feeling as if I was going to puke. I found the note, all directed in rainbows, colors, and smiley faces. It made me sick. I opened the note with nervoness and read.
        "Dear Juno and the son of bitches at school. Let me make this clear. I am not fucking gay. I am as straight as the pole your mom dances on. I should not have to tell people this, it's my life and you shouldn't be butting in. Pun intended. You caused this and I hope you feel great. You did it! You've killed me! I'm not gonna say that this wasn't your guys' fault because fuck that. It totally was. I hope you live with that burden that you killed me for your whole life. Juno, I hope you live a great life and don't cry over me, you didn't cause this. You are amazing and don't let people do what they did to me to you. I would punch their neck. (:
                                            Bye,
                                                  Daniel-Not fucking gay-Rigsbee
        What the fuck? That wasn't sad at all. This was the Daniel that I knew. He killed himself because he was done of the shit. I don't think he felt sorry or anything. I don't even know. As I turned to leave, I found something else. It was another note reading, "I hope this was exciting enough for you, Juno. I am a coward. I wasn't gonna deal with this anymore. They didn't win, remerber that. I won. They get to deal with my death. -Daniel"
         Fucking. Daniel.

title: Uhhmm...Well I'm 13 and I would like to be a writer when I get older so here's one of my short stories. Reviews? Be honest.

question: What does the story say about bullying?

answer: The author believes bullies didn't care about Daniel and that their bullying tactics might have made Daniel commit suicide. She believes the bullies are the ones who killed her friend. She points out that the bullies were unrelenting, and the only resolution he could find was to kill himself.

critique: The first sentence is a bit confusing. It would be better to say that the author believes bullies didn't care about Daniel and that their bullying tactics might have made him commit suicide.

text: The story's narrator, Juno, is not necessarily the author, so it's wrong to assume that the author is Daniel's friend.

question: Summarize the narrator's relationship with Daniel.

answer: Juno and Daniel are best friends and have been since 8th grade. She cares deeply for him. However, she didn't notice the student body's cruelty towards him. She was angry when she heard he committed suicide.

critique: The answer should mention that Daniel is the one who committed suicide.

critique: The narrator's anger at Daniel's death is omitted.

text: "However, she didn't notice the student body's cruelty towards him" is false. Juno is aware of the bullying.

question: Summarize the school's reaction to Daniel's death.

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the school's reaction was emotionless.

question: What does the story say about the bullies' reaction to Daniel's note?

answer: No answer

critique: The response can include the actual content of the note because it's declared to be public in the story.

critique: The response is incorrect. The story does not say anything about the bullies' reaction to Daniel's note.

critique: The response is not related to the passage.

critique: The answer should mention that the bullies did not react to the note.

critique: The answer should mention that the bullies didn't have a reaction.


text:
Mark Hand married Mary Marks, beget Job Hand, and was haunted by the financial meekness of his youth. Mark's father, Les Hand, possessed less fiscal solvency than a pack of deer, the herd having at least one buck. Young Mark swore he would not always live so meagerly and that when he grew up he would be an adept business man. In fact, one could argue that only once did he ever fail at a business endeavor.

A newly unteened and wed Mark bought at a great discount a large section of land in southeastern Pennsylvania from his dad's brother which had been his uncle's legume farm. So that is to say Mark bought his relative's peanuts for relative peanuts. Shortly after this acquisition the Pennsylvania state government came around wishing to buy the land with a more than generous offer. Mark devised a clever strategy where in he would sell them the land save one acre, the land his house was on. He drew up the legal document and the government unwittingly signed it. When state officials realized what had happened he offered to sell them both plots, the acre of land and the now trademarked scheme they had fallen for, at a laughably unreasonable sum. They declined opting to teach Mark a lesson instead. The government proceeded with their plans and built their facility that would encapsulate the Hand homestead. And this is how it came to pass that Job Hand was born inside a high-security prison.

Job was born at this house on a Monday. He should have been born on a Sunday, but his mother, a very religious woman, refused to labor on the Sabbath. Job would spend the first 18 years of his life on that one acre of land comparable to a manslaughter rap without release for good behavior. Job though was a very well-behaved kid. This was owing to the caring, teaching, and ministering from his Bible thumping mother. Mary Hand instilled in her son the belief in a vengeful God. She told and retold the stories of God's wrath. The fear of God would be strong in Job.

Often Job would find himself staring past the beautiful white picket fence as well as the electrified chain-linked fence into the yard of the prison. The things he saw would make him grow to fear equally the punishments of man as well as the wrath of God.

Three days after his 18th birthday he left the walls of the prison for the first time. He was leaving for college. He left the state pen for Penn State, heading up state from "up state". The new environment would cause Job much anxiety. He worried constantly of the morality and legality of his every action. He would spend an entire night hoping that he had exited the crosswalk completely before the red "stop" hand had appeared. He only ventured from his dormitory for class and for books from the library. His roommate tried to loosen up the intense Job, but to little if not no avail. He would comment to his friends that Job had a virtually inaudible chortle almost as if he was afraid that God would hear him laughing.

Job studied theology as his mother wished. She hoped her son would become a fire and brimstone preacher. He also studied business as his father sternly advised. His father wanting his son's bank account not to be like a male kangaroo's toilet that is to say containing jack shit. Oh, how the Hand family loved their animal analogies.

Despite Job's anxiety, his studies moved along quite swimmingly and was well on his way to fulfilling his parents' wishes for him. That is until his last semester before graduation. A professor would open his eyes to a new idea: forgiveness.

It was Father John who entreated his students to remember that not one of us is perfect and the corollary that we would all make mistakes. He taught that God allowed into his fold those who had sinned yet asked for forgiveness. This wasn't a radically new idea to Job he had read it in the Bible, but he had never heard it preached by an authority figure who possessed a scientifically provable corporeal body. Job would become quite smitten with this new God that did more than just smiting. Job became more relaxed. The intensity of his fears diminished. He felt free. He began to take this new found freedom out onto the campus. He began convorting with his fellow matriculaters. Drinking and sex would enter his life. For this is how freedom manifests itself on college campuses. Eventually, Job would become free of all fear. Where freedom once caused Job so much anxiety it was now an addicting adrenaline rush. Drinking and drugs enhanced that feeling. It was under these stimulants that Job would hurt one of his fellow students. Not mortally, but severe enough for Job's freedom to be taken away from him.
He was sentenced to 18 months and would be sent back to his old state pen. Not all the way back within the walls of his childhood home, but confined nevertheless by the concrete walls of the prison.

At first Job thought he was being punished by a vengeful God, enraged that Job had lost the true way that he walked during his youth. He would come to fear God again. He got down on his knees and was ready to renew his fearful life when a thought came to him. Would it matter if I did this if God was just a vengeful God? If He was only this would not His back always be turned to me? For I did forsake Him. Even though I have sinned and done evil the fact that I am still here is proof that God still wants me to do good. This means that God must be a loving and forgiving God. Maybe, it is not that I should fear Him and fear making mistakes. Fear even the freedom I have to do so. Maybe, it is that I am to be responsible and accountable for my actions. That is what I was sent here to learn. Something so very simple yet hard. For Job, fear and self pity were so much easier than freedom and responsibility.

Job was released and walked for the second time out the gates of prison. His incarceration over, but his conviction just beginning. He had learned in 18 months what he hadn't in 18 years. He took with him his remodeled desire to do good and his new found responsibility, and lived a very good life indeed.

title: State Pen

question: How did Job's perception of God change through the story?

answer: He once thought God was a vengeful God. Then he realized that God is not just vengeful. God is also forgiving.

critique: This answer fails to mention that Job's regression after realizing God was forgiving was due to a renewed fear.

critique: It's omitted that Job's perception of God changes after he is released from prison.

critique: The answer should mention that Job's perception of God changes after he is released from prison.

critique: The answer should mention his final conclusion.

critique: It's omitted that Job's perception of God changes again when he's released from prison.

critique: It's omitted that Job realized that God is forgiving.

critique: "He once thought God was a vengeful God. Then he realized that God is not just vengeful. God is also forgiving." - this is incorrect. He realized that God is forgiving and loving, not vengeful.

critique: The answer could be clearer in its pronoun use.