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The hikers had left a map of the area which gave us a vast layout of the land. It wasn't good. There were woods, woods, and  more woods. No place was safe, the dead had already begun to infest the forest as we knew, and hunting became harder and harder. The animals were nearly all gone and we were dangerously low on food, but no one wanted to get that conversation started. Our only option was to look for shelter in one of the surrounding towns. That's when I first heard Ryan's voice. I don't think he'd used it in about a month. He had to give it a couple of tries before the words came out smooth.
“My high-school's in the next town over, it's right at the edge of forest. There's a broken lock on a second story window, the chemistry lab. The cafeteria's full of cans and stuff.”
“There's probably people there already.” I said.
“Gotta try.” Spencer replied, “Ain't nuttin' else to do.”
	And again, he was right. The forest wasn't an option anymore and our food supply would only last another day or two. Soon, we would barely have the energy to stay awake much less trek through the woods hunting for squirrels. I'll skip the journey. It wasn't easy and it wasn't pretty.
	We got there two days after we started walking and had the last bit of rations about ten minutes before we saw the school. The possibility of food almost hurt- and I realized that the point I had made earlier was moot, even if there were people here, we were going to take whatever was inside, anything else would mean our deaths. Spencer and Ryan reached the clearing first. Emily and I fell behind when she had to stop to use the bathroom. I stood guard while the others walked on, I would have told Spencer he should stay with his girlfriend but I would rather have him as far from her as possible. When she came out she thanked me for staying with her, “...You took off your bow tie?” She asked. I had almost forgotten I was wearing a tuxedo. The white shirt had turned yellow and I’d long since ripped off the cummerbund. I took the tie out of my pocket, “I was going to throw it away but thought it might be useful some day. Don't know why I thought that.”
“You should keep it.”
“Why?”
“No reason, I just like it.” She said with a weak smile and walked ahead of me. I had never seen her smile before. It was nicest thing to happen in weeks.
	The school sat quiet. We stayed by the treeline for a few minutes before Spencer passed out the weapons. “Ryan'll go in through the broken window and open the back door for us, Emily, you can be the look out in case any wal-” Spencer stopped himself when he saw her. A girl of no more than sixteen, behind her another girl a couple of years younger. They were both in dirty white dresses, their eyes had sunk and they walked on slow frail legs. It took a minute of watching to see that they were not walkers but starving. The eldest girl bent down and picked up two pale yellow flowers from the ground. She put one behind her ear and the other in her sister's hair. They started to walk back, hand in hand but the youngest stopped- they stood for a moment and looked up a the sky. I looked at Spencer, at Emily, no one seemed quite sure of themselves anymore. The girls disappeared into the school.
	I gave Ryan a boost- he climbed the rest of the way up himself, he was gone a minute before the door clicked open. “See anything?” I asked him. He shook his head. We went in slow and quiet. We had learned the silent walk technique in the woods. Dry twigs were death traps. We were almost to the cafeteria when we heard the shots.
	All weapons went up- the gunfire came from the gymnasium Ryan told us. Five shots, four in quick succession and a space of about ten seconds until the last one. We had to move fast now, walkers would have heard the shots, we kept the doors unlocked behind us in case we had to run. And if there were walkers in the building- either way we had to know what happened. Ryan had to show Spencer the way and Emily was outside on watch. So I went to the gym alone, I was given five minutes before they would be out of there with or without me. I see it now like I saw it then.
	Walking into that gym, that was when I knew. The hope I had for a military rescue, that spark in the middle of your heart that tells you things will be okay eventually- that things are bad now but a day would come when everything would be like it was before, that was the moment my light went out. Five sisters had come to this school for safety. They'd made it as long as they could, they'd eaten all the food but the world outside hadn't changed. They had no one to take care of them. No parents, no policemen. All they had was a gun with five shots left inside. The younger ones had lines up, that ten seconds before the last shot- that was the oldest looking at her family and turning the gun on herself. I've thought about that day every day since. I've thought about running from the clearing and telling that sixteen year old that things would be okay- that she could come with us. And I've had dreams when she did, and Spencer was excepting and Emily was like a mother to the littlest of them. In my dreams we were all alive, we all belonged to the each other and when one of us was sick or hungry the others would take care of them. And those girls would play the games that children play.
	As I stood there and watched their blood spread out and pool together- I prayed for something to happen, anything that could change what I was feeling. I didn't care if it was a bomb going off or a military parade outside, I just needed to feel something other than that hopelessness. And then something did happen. The youngest of the girls stood up. Her sister had aimed for the heart. We thought only a bite could turn someone, but now I saw that that wasn't true. This wasn't an infection, this wasn't a disease. This was Hell, and it was coming for me in a white cotton dress and flowers in its hair.

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The Walking Dead: Winter Chronicles
Chapter Four: Five Sisters

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The US Government has been expanding in size and reach for decades. The federal budget, deficit, and government employee base is near an all-time high.

It wasn't always like that. Many of America's founders were Libertarian-minded and skeptical of the state, wanting only those parts of the government that were absolutely necessary.

However, there's reason to believe that in the near future, government might dramatically shrink—not because of demands by fiscally astute Americans, but because of radical technology.

Indubitably, millions of government jobs will soon be replaced by robots. Even the US President could one day be replaced, which—strangely enough—might bring sanity to our election process.

But it's not just robots, it's software programs and weird new tech that will do the replacing. Consider the over 1 million firefighters, a staple part of American government that also represents the ideal of service and career to one's country. Companies around the world are now building fireproof everything, including couches, furniture, and building materials that simply don't burn well. And intelligent robots—which I think will be in 50 percent of American households within five years time—will all have fire and carbon monoxide detectors.

In fact, I'm certain many in-home robots will not only be loaded with numerous security alert systems (like intruder alarms, flood warnings, and the ability to detect snakes, scorpions, and spiders) but will also be able to fix problems that occur. It's likely in just a few years time, in-home robots costing less than a $1,000 dollars will know how to put out a fire with an extinguisher, turn off a flooding bathtub, or squish a black widow.

Each time a robot or software can save an emergency call to a firefighter or police officer, money, time, and resources are saved. Twenty-five years into the future, we may have little reason to call any government service employee whatsoever—and institutions like the fire department may be significantly smaller.

The same idea goes for employees of the Internal Revenue Service, whose jobs crunching numbers can be done by even basic AI. Meanwhile, drones will replace building inspectors by flying around construction projects to determine safety and building requirements are being met. Even the tens of thousands of goverment highway workers will be replaced by driverless vehicles that automatically lay new roads down. Driverless construction equipment—just like a fully automated trucking industry—is the future. For that matter, even the White House may eventually turn to automated equipment such as driverless lawn mowers to cut its massive property lawns.

  Twenty-five years into the future, we may have little reason to call any government service employee whatsoever.

It's the military, though, where some of the robot revolution has already been witnessed on TV by many Americans. Instead of a company of troops on the ground, a single US soldier now sits in a military base on native soil controlling an armed drone thousands of miles away. America has approximately 2 million soldiers who can be quickly called up to service, but I think that number will quickly fall over the next decade as the US streamlines its military in the age of transhumanism—the age where machines do most of the work. Because national defense is such a large part of the Federal budget, this could save many billions of dollars for Americans.

Another area where technology can significantly help reduce government is the absurdly huge US prison system. Right now it costs almost four times the amount of money to run America's nearly 5,000 prisons and jails than it does to run the US education system. But in the near future, we might use drones and robots to monitor criminals, both in and out of jail.

Many of our prisons are filled with nonviolent drug offenders, anyway, and I think we should let them all go free. If people and politicians are too afraid of that, we could just have drones or tracking devices monitor them. This way many nonviolent criminals could find jobs and start paying taxes—instead of being a drain on government resources. Another benefit would be that many prison guards wouldn't need to be employed either, as there would be less criminals to monitor. Perhaps best of all, emptied prisons and jails owned by the government could be used for other things, like new colleges or job training centers.

I welcome this future smaller government as a result of evolving technology, and I hope that Americans will pay less in taxes as a result of it. In fact, I think it's possible to offer more social services—including a Universal Basic Income—from the govern

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KOKORI is one of the six suburban 'states' of the Agbon 'kingdom' in LGA Ethiope East, Delta State, Nigeria. The other 'states' are Okpara, Eku, Ovu, Orhoakpor, and Igun.[1]

Geography

Its land area is 196 square kilometres and is blessed with a period of downpour which lasts seven months (from March to October) and a relative five months of little or no rain (from October to February). It has twenty nine streets and roads; and it is surrounded by thirty village communities, including Samagidi a rapidly developing township. Network of streams and creeks cuts across different parts of Kokori territory. Three major streams are identifiable: the Omwe stream on Eku road, Iranzo stream on Orogun road and Erhanaka stream on Kokori – Ofuoma road.[2]

It is a hinterland bounded by Eku and Igun on the north; by Ugono, Orhomaru, Erhobaro, Ovara and Idionvwan villages all in Orogun, on the east; on the west by Isiokolo and Okpara Inland in Agbon 'sub-nation'; and by Awirhe in Agbara and Odovie in Ughelli on the south.[3]

The entire Kokori land is flat and situated in the evergreen tropical forest zone which is dominated by the oil palm tree.[4]

History

Kokori's original name was 'Ukori' and her people were called 'Uhwokori', an abbreviation of 'Ihwo-ru-Ukori'. The Uhwerun people changed the name to 'Tokori' when Agbon people led by Ukori, their ancestral father, migrated to stay on their land. British colonial administrators further changed the name to Kokori which she now bears. Five waves of migration birthed Kokori. First, from Benin to Asseh. Second, from Asseh to Irri. Third, from Irri to Uhwerun. A fourth migration graced the face of Urhobo history when they migrated to Isiokolo. In 1606 A.D, the incessant invasions and the conspiracy against the Kokori people because of the discord which bedevilled the four Agbon families- Okpara, Ukori, Eku and Orhoakpor- made Isiokolo turbulent and the Agbon families began to migrate to their respective present sites.[5]

Mentifacts

Kokori is cradle for the Igbe religion which began in 1858; founded by Ubiecha of Egbo Street in Kokori. Although it had no written constitution like the Decalogue of ancient Israel, it was able to mould Kokori society into one worthy of stay. The Igbe religion spread to many destinations beyond Kokori and the Urhobo nation at large.[6] In fact, based on its monotheistic vocation and puritan practices, it gained international platform – a congregation was established in London for the adherents in that destination.[7]

As regards her festivals, three festivals rear their terrific heads – Egba, Orerode and Ibi festivals respectively. The Egba festival celebrates the Egba fetish; the Orerode festival celebrates the ancestors of the Kokori people while the Ibi festival commemorates the gun fires that were fired against the invaders who threatened their sovereignty. The Egba and Orerode festivals are celebrated annually while the Ibi festival is celebrated once in a century.[8]

Demographics

Kokori people speak one tongue- urhobo. Kokori does not frown at intra-marriage and neither does it not smile at inter-marriage which enhances integration. In the first quarter of the twentieth century, Christianity was introduced to Kokori via the arrival of the Roman Catholic Mission in 1905 in Umiahwa quarter of the town; the Anglican Mission at Urhuokpokpo quarter in 1927; and the Baptist Mission in 1945. Thus, most of the people practice Christianity; some the Igbe religion which originated in Kokori in the pre-colonial era and found its way to the contemporary era and other parts of Nigeria; few, traditional faith; and, a very few, Islam.[9]

Administration

Kokori is divided into three administrative quarters- Alaka, Urhuokpokpo and Umiahwa. And the Okarorho is the administrative head of the town, in the absence of the Ovie. He rules by a council (Ehonvwore). The okarorho's spokesman is the otota who also is the spokesman of the town.[10]

Mineral resources

In 1958, Shell Petroleum Development Company carried out an exploration work which led to the discovery of crude oil on Kokori soil. She has over twenty oil wells and second best crude oil in the world by reason of its low sulphur content. In 1994, Kokori generated N68 billion for the federal government of Nigeria.[11]

Education

-   St. Kevin College ( Kokori Boys Grammar School)
-   Now St. Kevin's College, wholly owned by the Catholic mission.
-   Egbo Commercial Grammar School
-   Kokori Mixed Secondary School
-   Kokori Girls Grammar School.

[1] Success Akpojotor, Pre-Colonial Socio-Political History of Kokori Inland. B.A Thesis(University of Benin, Benin City, Nigeria) 2011. p.15

[2] Success Akpojotor, p.15

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[4] Success Akpojotor, pp.67-9

[5] Success Akpojotor, pp.16-25

[6] Success Akpojotor, pp.44-7

[7] http://www.waado.org/urhobo_community/archive...

[8] Success Akpojotor, pp.47-55

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[10] Success Akpojotor, pp.28-39

[11] S.J Odje, Kokori People, Ancient and Modern, Benin: Assembly Printers, 1995. pp.139-40

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answer: The Kokori people speak one tongue, the Urhobo language. Kokori does not frown at intra-marriage and neither does it frown at inter-marriage which enhances integration. The Igbe religion was founded in Kokori. There are three major festivals: the Egba, Orerode, and Ibi festivals. The Egba festival celebrates the Egba fetish, the Orerode festival celebrates the ancestors of the Kokori people, and the Ibi festival commemorates the gun fires that were fired against the invaders who threatened the sovereignty of Kokori. The Igbe religion is a monotheistic religion with puritan practices. Most of the people practice Christianity, few practice traditional faith, and a very few practice Islam.

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To many people, there is no such thing as a “happily ever after”. These people never get to experience what many do in movies and in stories of love and happiness. There is never a prince charming or a wonderful princess with a kind heart to save them from the turmoil their hearts are bound to; someone to sweep them off there feet. This story is no different. I begin this story with my death. It’s an untimely death that could have been prevented had I listened or perhaps had more options available. Or maybe it was fate that brought me to this point. The last seconds of my life were dramatic and suspenseful. There was a glimmer of hope here and there of me surviving the final blows that ended my life. Unfortunately that is not the case now as I am gone from the living. I could hear the doctors yelling to the nurses for more ‘O negative’. I could feel there hands on my chest pushing down hard as I slipped further and further away. The sound of my sisters cries before the ambulance was called to take me away. I could see the hopelessness in her eyes as she stood over me trying desperately to put pressure on the wound he created in my neck. That’s when I knew that the hope was lost, when I saw her eyes. She was a good sister, always had a heart of gold, room for others. Before the lost hope, before the pressure on my neck there was an argument. He was drunk, I was tired. My two children slept as I was getting home from work. That’s how it began though. He was drunk…

	Men. My entire living life I found no real use for them, not one, except my children. My father abandoned me as a child and the men my mother tried to replace him with were harsh and abusive. Perhaps this is what attracted me to my children’s father. He was charming, at first, everything I had been looking for while looking for my prince charming. Tall, dark, handsome, kind, and funny, these were the most attractive to start. His name was Tanner Williams; I met him on a cold November night at a house party. My sister, Maggie, didn’t like him at all, even then she saw the real him. She warned me before I went to him, ‘He’s no good. I’ve heard of his family, none of them are any good.’ I, however didn’t heed this warning, no, I went to him anyways with my confidence boosted by the third rum and coke of the night I held in my hand.

	‘Tanner right?’ I said coolly, he nodded. ‘Janice Mitchell.’ I smiled and so did he. ‘Just wondering if you wanted to get a drink?’
	His voice was low but soft, he sounded innocent, sweet. ‘Yeah, sure. What are you drinking?’

	We continued on the rest of the night on the front porch. It was quieter outside then in the house.  He told me of his family. Two older brothers, both with records and doing time; their father was a single father since his mother died when Tanner was very young, he never re married, never wanted to. Tanner worked construction to help his father pay for bills and they seemed to be a fairly functioning family. A pretty typical life for a twenty six year old man, graduated high school and decided college wasn’t for him, besides, he said, ‘Some one’s gotta help dad.’ I believe this was the point when I knew I liked him.

	I told Tanner of my family. ‘I have one sister, and a mother who lives with a douche of a boyfriend. They kicked me out when I was seventeen for dabbling in some harmless teenage experimenting.’ Though we still had a relationship I was only really close with my sister. I pointed to her as I talked about her. She was in the living room of the house. There was a large window with no curtains so it was easy to see her. She was surrounded by people. She had a heart of gold, letting anyone have one chance at her friendship and only those who really deserved it a second. The kind of girl who was the life of the party, smart, funny, pretty, but she just didn’t know it, which made her humble. I think that’s what attracted most people to her, the sweetest bitch you could ever meet. Then I told Tanner of my life. How my father left when I was young, and how my mother chose terrible men to be around two young girls as well as the abusive nature in which they controlled her. I dropped out of high school, and was now just living off of the welfare system. I had no thoughts or desire to go back to school. I was content, at the time, with the way life was going.

	We ended that night with a goodnight kiss and exchange in phone numbers. I was sure. He was it.

title: New Story I'm working on. Let me know if you think it's worth pursuing.

question: Summarize the theme of this story.

answer: The theme of this story is that life is not a movie, but it is full of ups and downs. If life was always good for everyone, then no one would ever have a tragedy like the one the narrator goes through. It is also a story about people not being able to make decisions for themselves, but having to live with the consequences of their actions.

critique: The narrator's death is not a "tragedy" in the sense of the word.

critique: It is omitted that it is about the narrator's life story.

question: Explain how the sweet courtship led to murder.

answer: The narrator met her children's father at a house party. They had a good time and exchanged numbers. The narrator's sister, Maggie, warned her not to get involved with him because he was no good. The narrator didn't listen to her. She told him about her life and how her father left when she was young, and how her mother chose terrible men to be around her and her sister. They ended the night with a goodnight kiss and exchanged numbers. She was sure he was the one.

critique: The answer is a summary of the story and not a description of the murder

critique: The answer should mention the argument that led to the murder.

critique: The answer should mention that the man was drunk.

text: The answer requires an edit to remove repetition.

category: coherence

question: Summarize the biggest factor in the narrator's demise.

answer: The narrator's husband, Tanner Williams, was drunk when he stabbed her in the neck. The narrator's sister, Maggie, tried to help her by putting pressure on the wound. The narrator's husband stabbed her again and ran off. The narrator's sister called an ambulance. The narrator died shortly after.

critique: The narrator's husband did not stab her again and run off.

critique: The narrator's sister did not call an ambulance.

critique: This is not a summary of the biggest factor in the narrator's demise. The biggest factor was that she chose a man like her mother had and that she was not careful enough.

critique: The answer is a summary of the story, not the biggest factor in the narrator's demise.

critique: There is no evidence that the narrator's husband stabbed the narrator again after running off.

critique: This is not an answer. This is also incorrect.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The narrator's husband did not stab her.


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WILLIAM SMITH (portrayed by Will Smith) is a fictionalized version of Smith and main character in the NBC television series _The Fresh Prince of Bel-Air_.

Concept and characteristics

The character of Will Smith is loosely based on the life of Warner Bros. Executive Benny Medina as well as the actor that plays him of the same name (although in the show 'Will' is short for William, while in real life it is short for Willard). Smith's charming and mischievous personality earned him the nickname “Prince,” which eventually became “Fresh Prince”. Smith had become a successful rapper, but lost most of his money because of poor budgeting. When NBC signed Smith up for the sitcom, he was almost bankrupt, and it immediately launched his acting career.[1]

Background

The premise of the character of Will, and of the show in general, is outlined in the opening theme. Will is a street-smart and laid-back West Philadelphia teenager. After Will gets into a fight his mother sends him to live with his wealthy aunt and uncle (Vivian and Phillip Banks) in Bel-Air.[2][3]

Storyline

Following Will's arrival in Bel-Air, he was a great distance from home and was considered an outsider by many people in his Bel-Air neighborhood. Early on, he had a picture of Malcolm X on his wall. He often disagrees with his cousin Carlton, whom he sees as not quite “black” enough because he doesn't talk like other young African Americans. While Smith sometimes perceives Phil as being overprotective of Ashley, he himself also can be; when Ashley asks him about sex, Will became shocked by Ashley's inquiry, which leads him and Carlton to go to a clinic to talk to a doctor about how to discuss sex with Ashley. His father, Lou, who had abandoned him at childhood, returns in the episode “Papa's Got A Brand New Excuse.” His dad promises to take him on the road with him, but later drops Will, and the resulting disappointment breaks Will’s heart. It is then that Smith tearfully realizes Philip is the closest thing he had to a father.

Though Will often teases his Uncle Phillip due to his obesity, he genuinely values Phillip as a father figure and fiercely defends him when his image or integrity is attacked by outsiders, especially in season 3's “Asses to Ashes.” In the episode, “Bullets Over Bel-Air,” Will is shot at a bank ATM while protecting Carlton from a robber. Carlton then feels that Will could have died saving him. During one of Will's visits back to his old neighborhood in Philly, he confronts the old park thug, Omar, to restore his damaged reputation. When Will challenges him, he is startled when a reformed Omar refuses to fight back. Omar shuns Will, and through him, Will gradually realizes that his reputation is not important.

Similar to his relationship with Uncle Phil is his relationship with his cousin Carlton. Though he often mocks Carlton mercilessly over his preppy nature, lack of “street cred”, and generally uncool nature, he is also fiercely protective of Carlton and will not hesitate to come to his cousin's defense. As stated previously, he even went so far as to take a bullet for Carlton. In another episode, Will quits a black fraternity when they refuse to let Carlton in for not being “black” enough. Will’s loyalty and love for Carlton are not lost on the latter, and in the final episode Carlton outright tells Will “Thank you for being the brother I always wanted.”.

At the conclusion of the show's run, the Banks family decides to settle in New York, while Will remains in Los Angeles to finish his last year of college. Will eventually becomes a close member of the Banks family and a better man by the series' end. Will delivers the last line of dialogue in the series: “I am definitely going to miss you, C.”

Reception

The character and Will Smith's portrayal received near unanimous praise from television critics & audiences alike. UGO editor Bryan Enk praised Will Smith's role as the character, stating “Rarely has there been a television series so perfectly tailor-made for its star than _The Fresh Prince of Bel-Air_ [...] _Fresh Prince_ fit Will Smith like a glove; it was obviously a showcase for him, but his co-stars were just as good, and Smith never hogged the spotlight (or the camera), allowing each cast member to shine in every episode.”[4]

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[2] Season 1, episode 1 _The Fresh Prince Project_

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title: Will Smith (The Fresh Prince of Bel-Air)

question: Summarize Will's relationship with his family.

answer: Will's mother sends him to live with his wealthy aunt and uncle in Bel-Air after he gets into a fight. He often disagrees with his cousin Carlton, whom he sees as not quite "black" enough because he doesn't talk like other young African Americans. Will is fiercely protective of Carlton and will not hesitate to come to his cousin's defense. He even went so far as to take a bullet for Carlton. Will's loyalty and love for Carlton are not lost on the latter, and in the final episode Carlton outright tells Will "Thank you for being the brother I always wanted."

critique: The answer should mention Will's relationship with his father.

critique: Does not mention his relationship with his father.

critique: It is omitted that he is initially close to his aunt and uncle; he has warmth for them and lives with them for five years.

critique: "Will's loyalty and love for Carlton are not lost on the latter, and in the final episode Carlton outright tells Will “Thank you for being the brother I always wanted.”." - redundant and should be deleted.

critique: The answer omits Will's relationship with his father.

text: The answer does not mention Uncle Phil.

question: Summarize the inspiration for the character.

answer: The character is loosely based on the life of Warner Bros. executive Benny Medina and the actor who plays him of the same name. The character was created for the TV series The Fresh Prince of Bel-Air.

critique: The character was created for the TV series, but the answer omits that the character is based on the life of Will Smith.

critique: The answer should include the creative process behind the character.

critique: The answer should mention that the character is based on Will Smith's life.

critique: The character was created for the TV series, but the answer omits the inspiration for the character.

question: What does the article say about Will's relationship with his mother after moving to Bel-Air?

answer: No answer

critique: The article does mention the relationship between Will and his mother.

critique: The article does mention Will's relationship with his mother.

question: Summarize the negative events that happen to Will over the course of the show.

answer: Will gets into a fight with his mother, who sends him to live with his wealthy aunt and uncle in Bel-Air. His father leaves him again. He is shot at a bank and suffers a wound. He is estranged from his old neighborhood in Philly. He is mocked by his cousin Carlton over his lack of street cred.

critique: The answer omits Will's financial troubles.

critique: "He is shot at a bank and suffers a wound." - this is inaccurate. Will was shot while protecting Carlton from a bank robber.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: It is omitted that Will gets into a fight with his mother, who sends him to live with his wealthy aunt and uncle in Bel-Air.

critique: "He is shot at a bank and suffers a wound." -  He was shot at a bank, but there was no wound.

critique: The answer omits Will's financial problems.

text: The last sentence is not accurate; Will mocks Carlton for his lack of street cred.

category: accuracy


text:
Todd Howard is pretty good at making games. After _Oblivion, Skyrim, _and two _Fallout _games, that’s a huge understatement. Each game has been well-received by fans and critics alike in addition to being hugely successful for his studio, Bethesda Softworks, and publisher ZeniMax. So when he says something, we tend to sit up and listen.

Speaking to _Polygon_ in an interview alongside his induction into the Academy of Interactive Arts and Sciences Hall of Fame, Howard put the future of big games squarely on characters and how we interact with them.

“I think we have a very long way to go in how other characters act and react to you. That’s the big issue we’re trying to solve. We’re pretty good at technology and world-building. We have a good handle on game flow, the rate you get new things, how you’re rewarded over time. But we need to be innovating on [characters],” he said.

Tough moral decisions offered to the player are a big part of that, and Howard feels that Bethesda’s games have been “pretty good at asking those questions,” but Howard adds that they need to get better at “letting the player deliver the answers to them.”

The Clash of Technology and Magic

The conversation system in _Fallout 4_ had plenty of detractors. It was derided as overly simplistic and lacking in meaningful options for the player. It’s been joked that the next game in the series would just let you pick a happy face of a sad face, and I get where that concern comes from.

Before we had video games, we had stories, and the first video games were just that – interactive stories. We wandered through pages of text with detailed literary descriptions of everything. Technology got better, and we started to add visual content to those games. Somewhere in the middle, we got games like _Fallout 2 _and _Planescape: Torment_. these were games that were, at the time, lavishly illustrated games, but they still offered deep description and a variety of ways to respond to any number of situations.

Back then, voice acting was just starting to make its way into games. If there was any at all, it was in short cut scenes, and that was it. Text was still the order of the day, and the only limit to the amount of text and number of options was how much time the writer had and how much they could output.

[]_Divinity: Original Sin_

Then 2D became 3D and sprites became polygons. Game development became infinitely more complex as the industry stretched and pushed technology to make games more visually impressive. Simply animating a character took far longer, let alone detailing how they would interact with their environment and everything else. But having a character do all this moving and acting with just text below them started to feel weird. Cut scenes became longer and more complex. Voice acting went from a sometimes thing to an all-the-time thing (thanks, _Metal Gear_).

The same way that RPG elements bleed over into action games these days, with complex leveling systems, crafting, and upgrades, the aesthetics of action games bled into RPGs. A space formerly reserved for text, turns, and isometric perspectives dropped down into the third- and first-person perspectives and voice acting crept in.

Taking the single character approach again, we used to have a single character that was a 2D sprite. It required some comparatively simple one-size-fits-all animation and art and plenty of writing, along with the usual programming and quality assurance. Now the character requires a modeler, a texture artist, an animator. Any change to the character sends it back through _all of these_. Then there’s writing, voice acting for every single line, all of which has to be figured out while the game is still being built.

So what Howard is talking about is something we had in years past. We had that detail and interaction. But it was through an interface that was impenetrable by many potential players. Now, we have the sort of interface and visual fidelity that appeals to more players, but the amount of work and time  – and thusly, money – required makes it significantly more difficult to offer the kind of choice we saw before.

[]_The Witcher 3: Wild Hunt_

If anyone has the budget to dig in and offer that kind of choice, it’s Bethesda. CD Projekt Red showed us that you can offer players interesting, meaningful choices and ways to handle dialogue, but even then, we had a game about a single character with a pretty specific moral compass. They tackled the problem in a specific way and did a good job, but it’s not the wide net of options Howard is talking about nor the wide net older games were able to cast thanks to their limitations.

We do see games attempting to capture the old magic. Obisidian’s _Pillars of Eternity_, Larian’s _Divinity:Original Sin_, and the upcoming _Torment: Tides of Numanera _from InXile offer the old-school overhead perspective and the wide-ranging choices those classic games offered. But they do it for a specific audience. A deserving and appreciative one, but a specific one.

The next _Elder Scrolls_ and _Fallout_ games are years away. Howard knows what he needs to do – find a way to bring the new closer to the old. To give us modern presentation with classic choice.

“There’s a long way to go,” Howard told _Polygon_. “We have so many ideas that we didn’t think we were ready for. But given our size now and how the tech is coming together, we can do some of the things we’ve talked about for a very long time. Now they are within our grasp.”

The temptation will likely be there to go bigger, wider, and more visual, but I’m hoping Howard hues close to what he’s talking about. If he and his team can, we’re in for a treat that’ll be well worth the wait.

The next game to come out of Bethesda’s cadre of studios is _Prey_ on May 5. Bethesda’s also hard at work on _Skyrim_ for Switch and _Falllout 4 _for VR, and it has five unannounced games on the way. Howard’s got a full plate and a worthy mission.

question: What are Howard's thoughts on Bethesda's games?

answer: Howard feels that Bethesda's games have been "pretty good at asking tough moral questions" but need to get better at "letting the player deliver the answers to them."

critique: The answer should mention that Howard feels that Bethesda's games have been "pretty good at asking those questions"

critique: The answer should include that Howard feels that Bethesda's games have been "pretty good at asking those questions"

text: It's omitted that Howard believes that Bethesda should be innovating on characters

question: Summarize Howard's feelings about his studio.

answer: Howard feels that Bethesda is good at technology and world-building. He feels that they have a handle on game flow, the rate at which players get new things, and how they're rewarded over time. Howard feels that they need to be innovating on characters.

critique: "I think we have a very long way to go in how other characters act and react to you. That’s the big issue we’re trying to solve. We’re pretty good at technology and world-building. We have a good handle on game flow, the rate you get new things, how you’re rewarded over time. But we need to be innovating on [characters]," is evidence of Howard's feelings about his studio. Include the necessity of innovation in the response.

question: Summarize the future plans of Howard's studio.

answer: Howard's studio is working on a game called Prey, which is coming out on May 5. They are also working on Skyrim for the Switch and Fallout 4 for VR. Howard's studio has five unannounced games on the way.

critique: The five unannounced games are not mentioned.

critique: The answer is not relevant to the question.

critique: The answer should mention that Howard is working on the future of big games.

critique: The answer should mention the future plans of the studio in relation to Howard's statements.

critique: The answer does not mention the future plans for the studio.

critique: The answer should mention the future plans Howard is talking about.

critique: The answer should mention the studio's plans for the future.

text: It's omitted Howard says that they plan to find a way to bring the new closer to the old.


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FREDERICK HAMBRIGHT (May 1, 1727 n.s.– March 9, 1817) was a military officer who fought in both the local militia and in the North Carolina Line of the Continental Army during the Revolutionary War. He is best known for his participation in the Battle of Kings Mountain in 1780. Serving as a statesman early in the Revolution, Hambright joined the War in 1777, ranked a lieutenant colonel in a local militia. His early actions were limited to occasional checks on (and some minor skirmishes with) Loyalist groups. This changed in 1780 with Hambright's important role at the Battle of Kings Mountain, which occurred near his lands in the newly formed Lincoln County, North Carolina. Hambright was commended for his bravery during the battle, though suffering a wound which forced him to permanently resign from military service.

A native of the Duchy of Bavaria, Hambright immigrated to Lancaster County, Pennsylvania in 1738. Between 1755 and 1775, he moved several times, first to Virginia, and then to various areas in North Carolina. After the War, he lived the remainder of his life near Kings Mountain.

Early life

Frederick Hambright was born to Conrad Hambrecht on May 1, 1727 in Moosbach, Bavaria (then part of the Holy Roman Empire and in present day Germany). He lived there for the first eleven years of his life, until the family immigrated to the Pennsylvania Colony on October 27, 1738, initially settling in Lancaster County. At the age of eighteen, Hambright left his father's home for Henrico County, Virginia. There he married his first wife, Sarah Hardin, sister of Colonel Joseph Hardin, who bore him 12 children, 6 of whom were raised to maturity.[1] Along with several neighbors, Hambright again emigrated, in 1760, to rural Mecklenburg County, North Carolina (in the area which was to become Tryon County in 1768), settling near the Catawba River close to a frontier fortification that ensured his family's protection from Indian attacks.[2] This area was to become part of Lincoln County, North Carolina in 1779, and eventually Gaston County, in 1846.

Revolutionary War

Service record:[3]

-   Lincoln County Regiment, North Carolina militia 1779-1783
-   9/9/1775, a major under Col. William Graham in the Tryon County Regiment (North Carolina)
-   June 1776, back to captain.
-   1779, a lieutenant colonel of Riflemen under Col. Andrew Hampton (Rutherford County Regiment).
-   May have been at the Battle of Stono Ferry in South Carolina
-   At the Battle of Ramseur's Mill in North Carolina under Col. Francis Locke (Rowan County Regiment).
-   Wounded at the Battle of Kings Mountain in South Carolina
-   Not very active during 1781 and 1782.
-   Resigned April 30, 1783.

Before serving as a soldier, Hambright was a signer of the Tryon Resolves of August 14, 1775, a document which declared that the signers would vow resistance against the British for their actions at the Battle of Lexington. He was a representative of Tryon County, at the Third Provincial Congress, which lasted from August 20 to September 10, 1775.[4] In late 1776, Hambright took part in the Rutherford Light Horse expedition against the Overhill Cherokee.[5]

When the war reached Tryon County in 1777, Hambright joined the colonial cause as a lieutenant colonel of the Lincoln County Regiment (locally known as “The South Fork Boys”). Hambright was called the “Terror of the Tories”.[6]

Battle of Kings Mountain

On May 22, 1780, Major Patrick Ferguson was assigned as “Inspector of the British Militia”, and was promptly ordered to march to Tryon County, North Carolina to raise troops and to protect the left flank of Lord Cornwallis's main body which occupied Charlotte, North Carolina at the time.[7][8] By September 10, Ferguson had established a military camp at Gilbert Town, North Carolina and issued a challenge to the Patriot leaders to lay down their arms or he would, “_Lay waste to their country with fire and sword_.”[9] After receiving this message, Patriot leaders Isaac Shelby and John Sevier quickly planned a preemptive campaign against Ferguson's army. They sent messages to military leaders William Campbell and Benjamin Cleveland to join them.[10] The rendezvous at Sycamore Shoals on September 25, brought to Campbell's army 200 Virginians and 160 North Carolinians.[11] Another 1,100 “Overmountain Men,” volunteers from the Washington District, also arrived to fight for the Patriot cause. The army met with Cleveland's 350 men at Burke County, North Carolina,[12] and the now 1,400–strong force marched towards the South Mountains.[13]

When word of this force reached Ferguson, he sent a message to Cornwallis asking for reinforcements. This message did not reach Cornwallis in time, and on October 1 Ferguson retreated towards the Broad River, asking for local loyalist militia to join him. By October 6, the Patriots had passed Gilbert Town and had reached Cowpens, South Carolina. Local sympathizers informed the Patriots that Ferguson had 1500 men camped on Kings Mountain.[14]

As they were pressed for time before Ferguson would continue on to Charlotte, Patriot leaders picked 900 men—including Hambright's—to ride to Kings Mountain.[15] By the morning of the 7th, they had reached Kings Mountain, surrounded it, and attacked. The militia's commanding officer, Col. William Graham, was absent during the battle due to an illness in his family, leaving Hambright in command.[16] Hambright's group, along with six units, was positioned at the “ball” base beside the “heel” crest of the mountain, in position suited to attack the main Loyalist position. The objective was to catch the Loyalists by surprise. During the assault, Hambright was severely wounded from a musket ball shot to his thigh. Although bleeding badly, he continued fighting. Hambright's comrades were impressed with his bravery, and as fellow soldier, Samuel Moore, later put it:

After the battle, Hambright was taken to his nearby log cabin for treatment. He survived, but had to resign from service due to his injury, which caused a permanent limp in Hambright's walk.[17]

Later life

[The Hambright Homestead, 1920.]

After his first wife's death on July 17, 1781, Hambright married Mary Dover. Together they had ten children, eight of whom survived to maturity.[18] He lived a quiet life on his homestead near Kings Mountain, until his death on March 9, 1817 at the age of ninety.[19] His remains were interred at Old Shiloh Presbyterian Cemetery in Grover, North Carolina.

Thomas Dixon Jr. was his grandson.

Footnotes

[1] Hunter p. 325

[2] Hunter p. 325

[3]

[4] Connor p. 409

[5] _Cherokee Expeditions_; Carolana.com; retrieved May 2016

[6] Hunter p. 326

[7] Buchanan p. 202

[8] Dameron p. 22

[9] Buchanan p. 208

[10] Buchanan, pp. 210-211

[11] Buchanan p. 213

[12] Buchanan p. 215

[13] Buchanan p. 217

[14] Buchanan p. 223

[15] Buchanan p. 223

[16]

[17] Hunter p. 327

[18] Hunter p. 327

[19] Hunter p. 327

title: Frederick Hambright

question: What does the story say about Frederick Hambright's role in the Battle of Kings Mountain?

answer: Frederick Hambright was well known for his participation in the Battle of Kings Mountain. He served as a lieutenant colonel in the Lincoln County militia and was very valuable to the Patriots in the war. He helped William Campbell and Benjamin Cleveland's forces rally to gain a strategic military advantage during the battle. His finest moment was during the battle when he was severely wounded during the fight but refused to leave until his wounded leg got him respectfully removed from the battlefield. His dedication and courage during the battle earned him a lot of prestige, which made the Patriots feel he would be a great help after his recovery.

critique: The answer should mention that Hambright was commended for his bravery.

critique: The response inaccurately mentions that Hambright was removed from the battlefield.

critique: The response inaccurately mentions that Hambright was wounded during the battle.

critique: The essence of the response could be stated more concisely.

critique: The answer is inaccurate in some details.

critique: The response contains inaccurate information.

question: What does the article say about Hambright's personal life?

answer: Hambright was born in Bavaria in 1727. His father and his brother were signers of the Tryon Resolves of August 14, 1775, a document which declared that the signers would vow resistance against the British for their actions at the Battle of Lexington. He probably married first to Sarah Hardin. Sometime after the Revolutionary War, he married Mary Dover, the couple had ten children, eight survived to adulthood and their grandson Thomas Dixon Jr. was the author of The Leopard's Spots. He died in 1817 at the age of nineties.

critique: The answer is irrelevant to the question.

critique: The statement that Hambright's brother and father were signers of the Tryon Resolves is unattested.

critique: -The response should not include the author of The Leopard's Spots.

critique: Doesn't mention all his children (he had 12).

critique: The answer should mention that Hambright had 12 children.

critique: The answer should mention that Hambright was a military officer.

question: What does the article say about Hambright education?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that Hambright's education is not discussed in the article.


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Friendship: A Dying Act

There is no longer any hope for mankind. What once was a natural instinct is now considered a physical strain. It seems as though the true meaning of the word "friend" has be altered, manipulated, and transformed into something that is hardly recognizable now. What does this mean? Friendship is dead.

Few people actually know what it means to be a "true friend". Some might argue that most people never knew to begin with; this is a sad truth. People in the modern society of today are facing too many difficult problems to focus on something as minuscule as "friendship". What problems could one possibly possess that would restrain them from participating in a ritual as old as time? It's hard to know where to start.

Most of those occupying the earth today will never truly understand the real meaning of friendship. They will not experience the joys and pains that accompany such a rare relationship. They will not even attempt to devote themselves to their friendship for fear of jeopardizing their own precious lives. It is easy to assume people today have many flaws that contribute to a lack of this understanding. People are selfish, focusing only on what is best for them. Few have any respect or regard for others. The concept of friendship is foreign to this type of bunch. Never will the self-centered people of our time understand friendship. The idea of putting someone else first is revolting. Why would anyone find joy in helping others when they can simply help themselves and receive better results?

Friendship is dead. It is a rock awkwardly positioned in the ocean. The waves that crash the landmark represent time. As the water passes by, it chips the edges of the boulder. Eventually, the rocky sculpture begins to erode and fade. The edges softening more and more with each hard blow, until the rock ceases to exist all together. All that is left are the remains of something that was once great, something so beautiful to look at and admire. The same can be said for friendships. The more time passes, the weaker the bond gets. Careless people of the new age, contemporary society are contributing to the casualty as well. There is no longer any hope for mankind.

A friendship so special, so rare in the world today should be admired and acknowledged. Instead, it is often questioned even criticized. No one will understand a type of friendship that provides hope and support. A type of unspoken bond that assures friends would do anything and everything for each other. There is no end to kindness. True friends recognize the other's needs before they are made public. They offer to help, simply because they receive joy and happiness from the act. There is no selfishness because real friends put the other person first; it is automatic. Such a unique relationship provides support that is hard to find otherwise. A true friendship is not in the words spoken, but those that are left unsaid. This friendship lies within implied messages. Real friends can sit in silence because they enjoy each other's company. The lack of sound and conversation is filled with unspoken truth and a bond that cannot be broken. Friends are content just being near each other.

This type of relationship used to exist, though it seems like many decades have passed since then. Gone are real friendships. They have been replaced by fake impostors. Selfish two-faced people have ruined the concept. Real friends are always there for one another, no matter the circumstances. People now tend to jump ship at the first sight of rough water. Instead of repaired the minor hole in their boat, they ignore it. Eventually the hole grows with the lack of attention. Then water fills the deck, dooming those still aboard. Boats sink, just as friendships fail.

The dying act of true friendships and meaningful relationships can still be saved. Few still exist, proving that not all hope is currently lost. People can change their ways, improve their relationships, and live an optimistic life. Whether that happens or not, will remain an unanswered question. The power of change is there; it is up to the people to decide how they use it. Ask not what your friends can do for you, but what you can do for your friends.

title: Friendship: A Dying Act

question: Describe the imagery in the passage related to rock.

answer: Rock is used as an analogy for friendship. The narrator compares the true meaning of friendship to a rock awkwardly positioned in the ocean, which represents time. As the waves crash against it, they chip away at the boulder and erode it, eventually eliminating it.

critique: The answer could be clearer in its pronoun use.

critique: It is omitted that the rock is described as a sculpture that begins to fade.

critique: The narrator's analogy is not the only imagery used to describe the erosion of friendship.

critique: The answer omits that the rock is compared to a friendship that is fading.

critique: The answer should mention that the rock is a metaphor for friendship.

critique: The answer should mention the metaphor of the boulder eroding.

question: What experience can one infer the narrator is having, accompanied by what emotions?

answer: The narrator seems to be having a despairing experience. They are feeling sad and are probably lonely.

critique: The narrator is not necessarily experiencing despairing emotions.

critique: It is important to note that the narrator is writing as though a close friend or friends have died or are very ill/far away, which is why he/she believes friendship and relationships are dying.

critique: The narrator is not necessarily sad or lonely.

critique: It is omitted that the narrator is also feeling hopeless.

question: What does the narrator recommend we do to "save friendship"?

answer: They recommend we ask what we can do for our friends, rather than what they can do for us.

critique: The answer is a bit misleading. The narrator does not recommend we ask what we can do for our friends, rather than what they can do for us. The narrator recommends we ask what we can do for our friends.

critique: The narrator does not explicitly state that they are recommending we ask what we can do for our friends, rather than what they can do for us.

critique: The answer is a bit misleading. The narrator does not say that we should ask what we can do for our friends. They say that we should ask what we can do for our friends.

critique: The question is not asking for solutions, merely the best language to describe how the narrator would describe those solutions. So saying "they recommend we do" is an interpretation of our own not asking them.

critique: The answer is a bit misleading. The narrator doesn't necessarily recommend we ask what we can do for our friends, but rather that we do for our friends.

critique: "They" should be replaced with "The narrator" to make the meaning more clear.

critique: The answer is a bit misleading. The narrator does not recommend we ask what we can do for our friends. They recommend we ask what we can do for our friends.

question: Describe the style of the essay.

answer: The style of the essay is a mix of opinion and fact. The author describes the current state of friendship and how it is dying. They then offer their opinion as to why this is happening and what can be done to fix it.

critique: The style of the text is more of an editorial than an opinion piece.

critique: The author does not offer their opinion as to why this is happening.

critique: The author does not offer their opinion as to why friendship is dying.

critique: The author does not offer any solutions.

critique: The author does not offer a solution to the problem.

critique: The use of the word "mix" is confusing. It's omitted that the author is offering their opinion/ experiences.

text: This is primarily an opinion piece: there is no evidence that the essay is steeped in fact.


text:
RADIO BILINGÜE is a non-profit public radio network with Latino control and leadership, is the only United States national distributor of Spanish-language programming in public radio. It is based in Fresno, California.[1]

This satellite network was formed to provide stations with news, information, and cultural programming in Spanish and musical programs showcasing a variety of Latino formats with emphasis on Mexican folk and Afro-Caribbean rhythms. Satélite Radio Bilingüe builds on Radio Bilingüe's decades-old tradition of talk programs, special events coverage and its flagship news service, Noticiero Latino, for stations across the United States, Puerto Rico and Mexico.

Radio Bilingüe is the recognized Spanish-language radio service for the public radio system in the United States. It serves over half a million listeners with its pioneering daily Spanish-language national talk show, _Línea Abierta_, its independently produced news service, Noticiero Latino, and its rainbow of Spanish-language folk music for its national Latino audiences. The entire 24-hour daily operation is totally devoted to public service. Radio Bilingüe has a full-time staff of twenty-five and a budget of two million dollars. Its funders include the Robert Wood Johnson Foundation, The California Endowment, the David and Lucile Packard Foundation, the Corporation for Public Broadcasting, the National Endowment for the Arts, the California Arts Council, the California State Health Department - Tobacco Control Section, and many other funding partners interested in informing hard-to-reach, low-income, Latino populations in California and across the U.S.

History

Founded in 1976 by Hugo Morales along with Latino activists, farmworkers, and community members, Radio Bilingüe (RB) became the first full-power FM radio station to provide media access and culturally and socially relevant news and information to the growing Spanish-speaking community of California’s Central Valley. RB is a non-profit, educational, public radio network aimed at serving primarily underserved and underrepresented Latinos, as well as to other minority communities, living in the United States.

Radio Bilingüe became formally incorporated in July 1977 when its articles of incorporation were signed. Two years later, on August 20, 1979, the Federal Communications Commission (FCC) approved Radio Bilingüe's application for its first station, KSJV 91.5 FM in Fresno. The radio station's first broadcast took place on July 4, 1980; but it wasn’t until August 5, 1980, that the FCC legally granted Radio Bilingüe its noncommercial educational FM station license.

Radio Bilingüe’s first home was on the fourth floor of the Mason Building of the Fulton Mall in downtown Fresno. Its 16,000-watt transmitter, located on Eshom Point in the Sierra Nevada, had the capacity to reach the Chicano and Mexican community living in the Central Valley of California between the cities of Merced and Bakersfield. Radio Bilingüe began featuring public-affairs shows focusing on farmworker issues in addition to musical content. The station would also broadcast forums and call-in shows on various topics, such as immigration reform, pesticides, labor law, and bilingual education. At the time of its establishment, Radio Bilingüe became the first bilingual public radio station in a major market and the third bilingual station in the United States.[2]

In the early 1990s, Radio Bilingüe experienced a development that marked a major expansion for the organization: it launched _Satélite Radio Bilingüe_, which enabled satellite transmission of its programming throughout the United States. This meant the radio station could reach many more of the Latino communities living across rural and urban areas in the country. In addition to the expanded U.S. coverage, Radio Bilingüe also began reaching Latino communities in Puerto Rico, in various states across Mexico, and in Vancouver, Canada.

Across the United States, Radio Bilingüe constitutes about one-third of the national Latino public radio system. In California, it serves three rural regions with concentrated Latino populations: the San Joaquin Valley, Imperial County, and the combined Monterey/Santa Cruz/San Benito County area. The largest of Radio Bilingüe’s service regions is the San Joaquin Valley; this area stretches from Stanislaus County in the north to Kern County in the south. In 2002, the San Joaquin Valley's various radio markets combined ranked as the seventh-largest Hispanic radio market in the country (Arbitron, 2002). Considering all three of its service regions, Radio Bilingüe would rank as the sixth-largest Hispanic broadcaster in the United States, reaching more than 1 million teens and adults living in Spanish-speaking households across the United States.[3]

Today, Radio Bilingüe's main office is headquartered in Fresno, California, and its news division office is located in Oakland, California. In the course of 34 years since its first broadcast, Radio Bilingüe grew from a single radio station with local reach, into a transnational radio network. As of 2014, Radio Bilingüe owns and operates 13 radio stations in Arizona, California, New Mexico, and Texas. Radio Bilingüe also has 9 repeater stations and 92 affiliate radio stations across the United States, Canada, and Puerto Rico (the number of affiliate stations may vary year to year).[4]

[1] Radio Bilingue IRS Form 990

[2] (“Bilingual radio station,” 1980)

[3] (Kissam et al., 2003)

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title: Radio Bilingüe

question: What does the text say about the founding of the radio network?

answer: The radio network was founded in 1976 by Hugo Morales along with Latino activists, farmworkers, and community members. It became the first full-power FM radio station to provide media access and culturally and socially relevant news and information to the growing Spanish-speaking community of California's Central Valley.

critique: The answer should mention that the network was formally incorporated in 1977.

question: What does the text say about the network's satellite radio service?

answer: Radio Bilingue launched its satellite radio service, Satélite Radio Bilingue, in the early 1990s. This enabled the network to reach many more of the Latino communities living across rural and urban areas in the country. The satellite radio service also enabled the network to reach Latino communities in Puerto Rico, in various states across Mexico, and in Vancouver, Canada.

critique: The answer should mention that the satellite radio service was launched in the early 1990s.

critique: The answer is awkwardly phrased and should use simpler wording. It also misses to mention that Radio Bilingue was able to cover a wider geographical area with its satellite radio network.

critique: The response inaccurately mentions that the satellite radio service enables the network to reach Canada.

question: What does the text say about the kinds of programming offered by the network?

answer: Radio Bilingue offers news, information, and cultural programming in Spanish and musical programs showcasing a variety of Latino formats with emphasis on Mexican folk and Afro-Caribbean rhythms.

critique: It is omitted that the network also offers public-affairs shows focusing on farmworker issues.

critique: The answer should mention the talk shows.

critique: The answer should mention the radio's flagship programming.

critique: The answer should mention that the network offers special events coverage.

critique: "of the network" - this is redundant and can be removed.

question: What does the text say about the network's plans for the future?

answer: No answer


text:
SANGOB RATTANUSORN (born 1943) is a former badminton player from Thailand who won numerous titles and represented his country in team play from the early 1960s through the early 1970s.

Career

A fine “all-arounder” (proficient in all three events: singles, men's doubles, and mixed doubles), Rattanusorn won eight Thai national singles titles between 1962 and 1970, and the Southeast Asian Peninsular singles title in 1967.[1] Outside of Asia, his most significant victories came in doubles events. He shared the U.S. Open mixed doubles title with England's Margaret Barrand in 1963, and the Canadian Open mixed doubles title with the USA's Lois Alston in 1968.[2] In 1968 he also won the Canadian Open and Dutch Open men's doubles titles,[3] and reached the men's doubles semifinal at the All-England Championships with fellow countryman Chavalert Chumkum. Perhaps the best year in his badminton career, however, came toward the end of it in 1973, when he helped Thailand to a surprise victory over Malaysia in the Asian zone final of Thomas Cup[4] before bowing to perennial champion Indonesia in the inter-zone ties.

Achievements

Asian Games

_Men's singles_

  Year   Venue                                       Opponent        Score          Result
  ------ ------------------------------------------- --------------- -------------- -----------------
  1970   Indoor Stadium Huamark, Bangkok, Thailand   Punch Gunalan   17–18, 10–15   [Bronze] BRONZE

Asian Championships

_Men's singles_

  Year   Venue                 Opponent        Score         Result
  ------ --------------------- --------------- ------------- -----------------
  1965   Lucknow, India        Dinesh Khanna   3–15, 11–15   [Silver] SILVER
  1969   Manila, Philippines   Muljadi         10–15, 3–15   [Bronze] BRONZE

Southeast Asian Peninsular Games

_Men's singles_

  Year   Venue                                    Opponent                   Score              Result
  ------ ---------------------------------------- -------------------------- ------------------ -----------------
  1965   Stadium Negara, Kuala Lumpur, Malaysia   Tan Aik Huang              7–15, 15–7, 7–15   [Silver] SILVER
  1967   Bangkok, Thailand                        Somsook Boonyasukhanonda                      [Gold] GOLD

[1] Herbert Scheele ed., The _International Badminton Federation Handbook for 1971_ (Canterbury, Kent, England: J. A. Jennings Ltd., 1971) 303, 335.

[2] Scheele, 314, 138.

[3] Scheele, 137, 246.

[4] Jack Van Praag, “National and International News,” _Badminton USA_, May 1973, 10.

title: Sangob Rattanusorn

question: What does the text say Sangob Rattanusorn excelled at?

answer: Sangob Rattanusorn excelled at badminton. He was proficient in all three events: singles, men's doubles, and mixed doubles. He won eight Thai national singles titles between 1962 and 1970, and the Southeast Asian Peninsular singles title in 1967. He shared the U.S. Open mixed doubles title with England's Margaret Barrand in 1963, and the Canadian Open mixed doubles title with the USA's Lois Alston in 1968. In 1968 he also won the Canadian Open and Dutch Open men's doubles titles, and reached the men's doubles semifinal at the All-England Championships with fellow countryman Chavalert Chumkum.

critique: "Sangob Rattanusorn excelled at badminton." - this is a tautology and should be removed.

critique:
-The phrasing of the question should not be taken literally as "game." Instead, the model should consider using a more flexible, relatable form of words.
-Phrasing the first sentence should be clear and concise. The model should know the direction of which she is spreading the answer.


text:
[The Velaires]

THE VELAIRES were an American rock and roll band from Sioux City, Iowa.

Early years

[The Velaires] The group began as The Screamers in 1958. Founding member Don Bourret explained the origin in a 2013 newspaper article:

  We were the Screamers in 1958 at Central High School. Truth be known — we actually got our start as a group of mostly swimmers who liked to sing in the shower. So we decided to enter the Central High School talent show. The singers were Denny Wurster, Jerry DeMers and Jeff Lockhart and musicians Bob Dawdy, Roger Hughes and myself. Our sextet performed “Bebopalula”.[1]

They soon after changed their name to The Flairs (not to be confused with the doo-wop group The Flairs based in Los Angeles). However, after playing in the legendary Val Air Ballroom in Des Moines, and with numerous groups on the scene with that same name, they became The Velaires.

Personnel

[Danny and the Velaires. In the photo are the original members, left to right: Bob Dawdy, guitar; Gary Kimble St. Martin, drums; George Norman, bass; Danny Matousek, guitar and lead vocals; Carolyn Chipman (later, Carolyn Matousek), vocals.] The band consisted of Daniel Matousek on rhythm guitar, Bob Dawdy on lead guitar, Jerry DeMers on bass and Don Bourret on drums.[2] The fifth Velaire was their full-time manager and booking agent, Dan's older brother, Richard "Dick" LaMiere Matousek.

First group

In 1961, as THE FLAIRS, they released their cover of Chuck Berry's classic, “Roll Over Beethoven” on Palm Records. Later in 1961, as The Velaires, they signed with Jamie Records and again released “Roll Over Beethoven”.[3]

The record leapt onto the _Billboard_ charts rising to No. 51 nationally[4][5] and reaching No. 1 in Los Angeles. It is reckoned to be the highest selling cover of “Roll Over Beethoven” ever.

Bourett said that the name change from The Flairs to The Velairs resulted from a problem with a recording company contract. When they needed to make a change, he explained: “We had just played the Vel Air Ballroom in Des Moines, so we said, 'Hey, let's become the Velaires!', a slight difference in spelling of the ballroom, and, that has stuck ever since.”[6]

While “Roll Over Beethoven” was on the charts, The Velaires had the opportunity to appear on Dick Clark’s _American Bandstand_ in Philadelphia being the only-Iowa based group to have ever done so.[7] They also joined the Caravan of Stars for a time.

They would follow “Roll Over Beethoven” with eight more releases on such labels as Jamie Records, Mercury Records, Palm Records, Ramco Records and Brent Records. Other releases on Jamie Records included their cover of “Dream” (Johnny Mercer) and “Ubangi Stomp” (Earl Bostic).

Re-formed group

The original members would stay together until 1963 when Dan Matousek would reform the group and continue on until 1970 under the name of Danny and The Velaires.

This band recorded in 1966 in Omaha several originals that received ample airplay, but never charted after “Roll Over Beethoven.” Gary Kimble St. Martin left in 1967 to join Iowa Rock 'n' Roll Hall of Fame group, Greg Scott and The Embers.

In 1997, much-deserved recognition came their way when Germany’s Bear Family Records released on CD their Greatest Hits/Anthology, _The Screamers To Flairs To The Velaires: Sioux City To Phoenix_.

Later years

The Velaires continue to tour with drummer Bourret, keyboardist Gene Ambroson, bassist Mike King, guitarist Bill “Chopper” Pelchat and saxophonist Dave Napier.[8]

Recognition

The Velaires are in two state rock and roll halls of fame. They were inducted into the Iowa Rock n Roll Music Association's Hall of Fame in 1997[9] and into the South Dakota Rock and Roll Music Association's Hall of Fame in 2013.[10]

Deaths of members

Daniel Matousek died in May 1998 just a few days prior of a scheduled performance of the group at the DanceMor Ballroom in Swisher, Iowa.

Dick Matousek died on October 24, 2011, at home, in Sioux City, Iowa. He was 74.

Bob Dawdy died on January 21, 2013, at home, in Sioux City, Iowa. He was 70.

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title: The Velaires

question: What does the text say about Danny and The Velaires?

answer: Danny and The Velaires was a band formed by Dan Matousek in 1963. They recorded in 1966 in Omaha several originals that received ample airplay, but never charted after "Roll Over Beethoven".

critique: The answer should mention that the band was active until 1970.

critique: There is no mention of when they were formed.

critique: The answer should mention the original members.

critique: The band was not formed in 1963. It reformed in 1963.

critique: The answer omits that the original members stayed together until 1963.

critique: It's omitted that the group disbanded in 1970.

critique: The answer should mention that the band disbanded in 1970.

question: Summarize the original band's name changes.

answer: The band began as The Screamers in 1958. They changed their name to The Flairs in 1959. They were then called The Velaires after playing in the Val Air Ballroom in Des Moines.

critique: The Velaires were not named after the ballroom.

critique: The answer should mention that The Flairs changed their name to The Velaires because they were confused with another band.

critique: The answer omits the band's name before The Screamers.

critique: The answer should make it clear that the band's name was changed not just once, but three times.

critique: The answer omits the band's name change from The Flairs to The Velaires.

critique: The Velaires changed their name after playing in the Val Air Ballroom.

critique: The band was called The Screamers in 1958, not The Flairs.

question: What does the text say about intellectual property?

answer: No answer

critique: The text does not mention intellectual property.

critique: The answer should mention that the band was not concerned with intellectual property.

critique: The text doesn't say anything about intellectual property.

critique: OK, here's a sentence explaining it as such

critique: The article does not mention intellectual property.

question: What does the text say about George Norman's death?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that George Norman is still alive.


text:
Thank you very much for taking the time to read this because I need you to give me constructive criticism on my still in-progress work. I know it is incomplete, but I need advice about my writing style, appeal, etc. so I can better myself. If you like it, great! If you do not like it, tell me why you do not like it in a constructive manner. I hope my paper is free of grammatical errors and I hope you enjoy the first chapter of "The Lone Wolf"!

I pressed the ashes and the dirt together into a neat mound and I stood up to look at it. Tears welled up in my eyes and I wiped them with my sleeve. After only a week’s struggle, both of my parents were dead and I was alone. I looked around at the destruction around me, seeing fires blacken rubble and electric wires sparkling. I looked back down at the grave and my makeshift cross, hoping it would suffice for the sacrifice my parents made to me by protecting me in the last raid. Now, I needed to survive by myself and for myself. I said a few quiet words for my parents and I prepared myself for the road ahead of me.

            My name is Michael Greaves, a seventeen year-old survivor on the road trying to scavenge for food and water. I was a military brat before this cataclysmic event and my parents were military veterans from the Marine Corps. I barely outlasted a bandit raid with my MP5 submachine gun and my P99 pistol, but my parents saved me in the flash of the last moments of their lives. When the marauders stormed the remains of our house and ran down to the cellar, my parents brandished combat knives and they ambushed them. I was told to sit in the corner with my MP5 on my lap and a blanket over my body so the bandits wouldn’t see me, but I watched my parents wrestle them to the ground. I heard a shot ring out in the cellar and my mother screamed. The second shot sounded soon after the first. All was silent and I was trying my hardest not to cry out and tears were falling out of my eyes. I quickly wiped my face and I tore off the blanket, revealing my gun. I shouted my loudest and longest shout as I was unloading all of my bullets uncontrollably on these helpless thieves. I wasted all of my MP5 ammunition on their dead bodies. Once my voice cracked, I stopped screaming and I returned to the cruel reality of my parents’ deaths. I fell to my knees and I slumped over their bodies and I must have cried all night.

            When dawn’s light reached through the cracks of the cellar’s ceiling, I knew what I had to do. When I picked up my mother, I wept hard once again. I tried carrying my mother up the broken stairs and it felt as if all of the world’s weight was put on my arms. When I got outside, my knees broke down in an empty space apart from all of the rubble around me and I set my mother down. This was hard on me both mentally and emotionally and I couldn’t think of an even worse way of their deaths.

I dragged my feet down the stairs and I saw my father lying on his side with his back turned to me. I tried picking up my father, but I was too weak and I cried again. I didn’t even want to drag him up the stairs, pulling his dead arms, but it was the only way. His head was knocked around on the broken stairs and it only made me feel worse about myself. I pulled his body next to my mother and I went back downstairs to get a shovel.

With every scoop of dirt, ash, and rubble, I grunted pathetically every single time. The grunting only got progressively worse when I kept looking at my parents’ peaceful faces. Tears flew out of my eyes with every deliberate scoop. I took a long break to avoid thinking about my parents, but it was the only thing I could think about and I cried silently when I returned to work. I finished digging and I looked at the close sunset on the horizon. I didn’t want to leave my parents out here in the cold, but it was too dangerous to linger out here with raiders lurking about. I placed my parents in one grave together and they looked peaceful together. I put my mother’s right hand in my father’s left hand and it somehow made me feel better, but I ignored the feeling quickly and I garrisoned myself in the cellar.

After dawn made its appearance again the next day, I emerged from the cellar and I found my parents unchanged. I started to drop the dirt on my parents from their feet to their heads. I didn’t cry this time because I knew I needed to become strong from this experience and keep moving forward with my life. The mound was irregularly arranged, but I changed my focus to the headstone for them. I didn’t know how to honor their sacrifice so greatly with only a few words carved in stone, and instead, I took two broken planks and twine and I crafted a makeshift cross. I stuck the cross at the head of their grave and I pressed the dirt and ashes together into a neat mound.

No matter how hungry or thirsty I was, I still took a knee and said a few words for the funeral service:

“Mother and Father, I’m terribly sorry I couldn’t protect you. Your deaths were your ultimate sacrifice to me and I am humbly grateful for all you have done to nurture and protect me. I know you wouldn’t want me to result to vengeance because that is not what God wants. Your sacrifices were intended to keep me alive and I will survive by any means necessary.”

My voice became very dry and I could talk no more. I went inside the cellar to prepare myself for the road ahead of me. I took the marauder’s pistols, the remainder of canned food, the last two bottles of water, my parents’ bloody combat knives and their assault rifles, a bottle of painkillers, and I put them all in my backpack. It was a heavy load, but I knew it would get lighter over time. I emerged from the cellar at around noon and the sun shown brightly on my face. I pulled my ripped handkerchief up to my eyes and I put my sunglasses on. I tightened my backpack’s straps and I started on the road.

title: The Lone Wolf (still in working progress; read description before reading short story)

question: Summarize what the story wants its readers to feel.

answer: The story wants its readers to feel sad for the narrator, Michael, who is a seventeen year old boy who has just lost both of his parents. The story wants its readers to feel sad for Michael because he is now alone and has to fend for himself. The story wants its readers to feel sad for Michael because he has to bury his parents and he has to leave them behind.

critique: The story also wants its readers to feel hope for Michael, as he is about to go on a new adventure.

critique: The answer should mention the narrator's resolve to survive.

critique: The story wants its readers to feel sad for Michael because he has to bury his parents and he has to leave them behind. - this is redundant and should be removed.

critique: The response is missing the part about Michael's parents being military veterans.

critique: The story also wants its readers to feel sad for Michael because he has to bury his parents and he has to leave them behind.

critique: The note telling what the text says would be better in response to the question and removed from the answer.

text: The answer repeats the phrase "the story wants its readers to feel sad" at the beginning of each sentence. It shouldn't.

question: What imagery is prominent in the story?

answer: The imagery of death is prominent in the story. The narrator's parents are killed in a raid, and they bury them. The narrator buries them in a grave and then buries them with dirt. The narrator buries them with a cross. The narrator buries them with a few words.

critique: The narrator doesn't bury them with a cross.

critique: Grammar error. The answer should be rewritten.

critique: The narrator buries them with a few words, not a few words.

critique: The narrator buries them with a few words, not the grave.

critique: The response contains unnecessary details not useful for the task.

critique: The narrator's parents are not killed in a raid, they are killed by raiders.

text: The narrator burying his parents is expressed confusingly. The repeated phrase "buries them with..." is the main culprit of the answer's confusion.

question: Where is the narrator headed to?

answer: It's not clear where the narrator is going.

critique: It is clear where the narrator is going.

critique: The narrator is going to the road ahead of him.

critique: It is clear that the narrator is headed to the road.

critique: It is clear where the narrator is headed.

critique: The narrator knows what he's doing and where he's headed.

critique: The protagonist decides to leave the area after burying his parents

question: Describe the relationship that the narrator had with his parents.

answer: The narrator had a very close relationship with his parents, evident by the fact that they died protecting him.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator honors the sacrifice his parents made.

critique: It is not stated that the narrator had a very close relationship with his parents, evident by the fact that they died protecting him.

critique: The answer should mention the narrator's feelings about his parents' deaths.

critique: The answer could be more specific about the type of relationship the narrator had with his parents.