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Part 1

I woke up and glanced at the clock to the side of me. 5:30. I never woke up that early. Even for school. I felt, different, though, somehow. Like I was being watched. Like I was in a movie or a book or something. But it was more than that. I was motivated? I guess? That fits well enough. I was motivated. I wanted to do something.
  I slowly got up and started to get ready for school. I dreaded school. I hated most people there, and they hated me back. I honestly don't know why I went. If it was up to me, I wouldn't. It was a big waste of time. I really hated it.
  I was never bad in school, but nothing exceptional either. It wasn't the work though, it was the people. If you were any different than the hive mind you were made an outcast. I wasn't one though. I had a good amount of friends, and knew the right people to not be made fun of, but I just never liked most of the people there. They were cruel and unforgiving. I didn't like them.
  So you're probably wondering why I still went? Well like many people, it was because of Her. I never knew her name, only what she looked like. She was amazing, but she hated me. I only still went to school because I thought I would have a chance of her not hating me. If I just had a chance to talk to her, or something, maybe she wouldn't hate me, like many people do.
  I honestly don't know why I'm telling anyone this. Nobody cares. But I don't mind. I don't care. I've been told countless times that I could never get her. Or anyone, for that matter. But I didn't care. I kept trying.
 Again, I know nobody cares, but this is my story. And I'm going to tell it for once.
  I went to school, again dreading it. The day wasn't anything special. I went to my classes, nothing more, nothing less. The worst part about school I think was how uneventful it always was.
  Anyway one thing did happen today, I talked to her. It turns out, she doesn't hate me, just never bothered to talk to me.

Part 2

He talked to me today! I couldn't believe it! Then, after I got over the shock, I felt so idiotic for not saying more. For not saying "I think I love you" or at least "Can we be friends?" All I could manage was "H-h-hi." Imbecile. Now he'll never know that I can't stop thinking about him and probably never will. Now he'll never know that I think he's amazing. And he'll certainly never, ever know that someone, even if it's just me, needs him.
  School was......school. I mean, I was pretty intelligent, I suppose. Made pretty good grades. But where does that get you in life? Further than most people think, but that's the point. The people who decide your social standing are highly unqualified to do so. But do I care? Not in the slightest. I'm not disliked. I'm friendly with pretty much everyone, but mainly, I'm not noticed at all, really. I'm not bothered by that. Trust me, most people at my school, you wouldn't want to notice you, either. The one thing that drove me crazy was that he didn't notice me. At least, I thought he didn't for awhile.
  Once, I heard from a friend who heard from a friend who heard him talking about suicide. I doubted he'd talk about it, but I didn't doubt he'd do it. This scared me. I realized I didn't exactly have a lot of time to tell him anything really. I had to force myself into his life. Honestly, I could care less if the whole world hated me. But not him. Please, not him.
  The reason I liked him was because you could tell by looking at him that he understood you. Not necessarily everyone, but I knew he'd understand me. I knew that maybe I could be someone he liked. I hoped I could be someone he loved. I just didn't know how to tell him.

title: Us

question: What does the story say about the narrator's relationship with the girl from his school?

answer: The narrator has a crush on a girl from his school. He goes to school every day because he thinks he has a chance of talking to her. He talks to her one day and finds out that she doesn't hate him, but never bothered to talk to him.

critique: The answer should mention that the girl is the one the narrator has a crush on.

critique: It's omitted that the narrator does tell the girl about his feelings for her, but she only likes him platonically, and was never going to act on the infatuation her and the narrator had.

question: What does the story say about how long the narrator and the girl know each other?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the girl and the narrator don't know each other.

text: The answer should indicate that the story doesn't say how long the narrator and the girl knew each other.


split: train

text:
There i was, it was an early day for me, unusually early considering my sleep problems, yet there i was at the internet cafe , again. I had logged on already when an older, much older lady walked in to use their phones for a long distance call, she was asking the attendant something about rates, but the attendant didnt speak good engish, so i helped her out.

The old lady attempted to make a phone call and then came out of the booth, and glanced over the titles of my emails while standing behind me, she saw something astrology had sent me, and she immediately asked me if i was into that, and i said , well im not sure what i said, but then she asked me my name, date of birth, sign etc, all the usual details.

Then she looked up in the air above me and to my side, pointing with her finger for what seemed to be like for her use, cause i sure as hell didnt see anything nor did i know what she was doing.She started telling me about her life, and describing it before and after she had left and arrived in this country, and then she said it, those words that i had only heard one other person say in my entire life, she told me before she use to come here she use to stand/sit in her country looking in the direction of america, and say to herself, "thats where im going". She was Russian

I was a bit taken aback by that, i wasnt sure wether to divulge that information to her or not, im not sure wether i eventually did or not, because after, i asked her about her drawing in the air, and she started mentioning planets, and transits and that sort of thing...and then she told me i was going to live a long time, not to worry that i would live a long time, she even had an approximate age, she said that i would live to be anywhere between 103 years old and 105 years old, i honestly didnt care.

Fast forward a couple of weeks , and there i was talking to one of my favorite people in the neighborhood, irish jimmy, by the corner store, poor jimmy was older and had problems with drinking and drugs and other types, but he wasnt a trouble maker, and he never judged me, nor did he ever know what was going on with me , unlike everyone else in the neighborhood, those nosey gossiping fake fucks.

it was a nice day, the sun was out, i was sitting on a milk crate with my back to the store/wall, and jimmy was making me laugh, not a bad day at all, a little while had passed by and jimmy was still going on with jokes and how he used to live it up in the old days, when he was much younger, i could tell he was catching a nice buzz from the beer i bought him, not his first beer of the day, i dont like drunks, as the matter of fact i hate them, but i didnt mind jimmy.

Jimmy and i spoke of longevity at this point in our ramblings..living, dying , old age and the such...almost exactly at the same time that Jimmy was about to start a sentence i noticed the minivan of the russians or croatians or whatever pulling up to the light, when jimmy said: "you know how i know i'm going to live a long time? because i'm meant to suffer", and then the light turned green and those russians made the turn, as they turned by us, i noticed an old lady in the back seat , older than usual, i dont think i had seen her before,.

A  few thoughts ran thru my head...the old russian lady at the internet cafe , whom i happen to mention to jimmy during our old age and death ramblings , which is why he replied what he replied, the fact that the old russian lady that had nothing to do with these russians and the old lady in the back seat i had never seen before, the fact that jimmy didnt know any of these people, the timing of it all, and lastly what my therapist and plenty of people had told me before about a "drunk man's words" or something of the sort which i cant remember because i dont deal with drunks as i have previously written.

I never saw the old lady from the back of the minivan again, nor did i ever see the old lady at the internet cafe ever again, just saw them that one time each, and i spent alot of time at the internet cafe both before and after...

and then there was jimmy from around the corner, him i saw all the time, but not after that time, not after what he told me that time, I never saw him again.

title: I never saw him again

question: What could have happened to Jimmy?

answer: It is possible that Jimmy is a figment of the narrator's imagination.

critique: Based on the story, Jimmy is a real person the narrator meets.

critique: The narrator is not the one who is imagining Jimmy.

critique: This response is not related to the question.

critique: "It is possible that Jimmy is a figment of the narrator's imagination." - while this is possible, it is not stated in the story. We don't know if Jimmy is real or not.

critique: No evidence that Jimmy is a figment of the narrator's imagination

critique: There is no evidence to suggest Jimmy is a figment of the narrator's imagination.

critique: There is no evidence to suggest that Jimmy is a figment of the narrator's imagination.

critique: It is possible that Jimmy is a figment of the narrator's imagination but the text does not support this conclusion.

critique: It is not stated in the story that Jimmy is a figment of the narrator's imagination.

critique: It might be implied that he has died, but it is not explicitly stated.


text:
As my eyes open, blinded by the light coming from the window, I drag myself from the cozy warmth of my bed and stagger to the bathroom. When I get to the bathroom I splash some water on my face and look at myself in the mirror. I look like I have been dragged through hell and back. As I’m looking in the mirror, I notice a shadow from behind the shower curtain.
“Jason? Is that you?”

No reply.

I approach the curtain and throw it aside. Standing in the shower is my roommate, his eyes bloodshot and swollen and teeth blackened from years of smoking and poor hygiene. Then I smelt and saw something terrible. His body had begun to rot away from his bones. My eyes widened as I realized what had happened. He had been infected.

It was at that moment that I knew I was in trouble.

I flee from the bathroom in a terrified frenzy, slamming the door behind me, and run to my room where I frantically get dressed and grab the survival kit I keep in the wardrobe. Hearing the noises coming from the bathroom, I leave the house and walk out onto the empty street. With nothing but my backpack filled with food and ammunition, my trusty sawn-off shotgun and my ever faithful baseball bat, I start walking away from my house, hearing it burn behind me.

After hours of walking, I finally get to the Pine Hills shopping Centre, as I enter the centre, I can feel the eyes of hundreds of people staring at me. My heart begins to pound and I can feel my adrenalin rising as I see that everyone is rotting away before my eyes. I panic and pull out my shotgun and begin to let loose. With each shot fired, I see mangled bodies drop to the floor, but each dead body that falls is replaced by multiple living ones. As the infected start surrounding me, I decide that it is time that I got out of here, so without thinking I run down the corridor, only to find that the infected are coming at me from both directions.  I draw my baseball bat from my back pack and make a mad dash for the exit, bodies crumpling in my wake. I finally make it outside, but I don’t stop running, I can’t stop, I have to get away from here.

After what feels like hours, I have to stop running and rest. Taking the last sip from my water bottle, I notice that it’s starting to get dark and that I need to sleep. After walking for about an hour, I find a house that looks deserted and decide to seek refuge in its walls. Warily I enter the house and walk to the nearest room, to my surprise there is a king sized bed with clean covers and a small fridge next to it. Looking in the fridge I find an unlabeled bottle of liquid, I open it and am instantly hit with a wave of sensory delights.  I smile to myself and take a swig of the bottles contents, its warmth travelling through my body and making my fingertips tingle. After emptying the bottle down my throat, I fall asleep.

Woken by the blinding light, I think I am home in my own bed, only to find that three large men in white uniforms are shining torches in my eyes. Ignoring my efforts to escape, they drag me almost effortlessly to their van and throw me into the back, my head hitting the steel seat inside and knocking me unconscious.

Once again by bright lights, I find myself strapped to a cold steel table in a white room. I can just hear the men in white talking from outside the door.
“According to his driver’s license, this guy’s name is Mitchell Cameron, He’s a Iraq veteran from Pine Hills, that little town a few miles away..” said the first man in white.
“I thought he looked familiar!” exclaimed the second man, “he was in the news a few months ago, apparently he had some sort of mental breakdown and set fire to his girlfriend’s dog.”
Hearing this sends me into a panic. I can feel the straps loosening as I struggle against them. After hours of struggling, I am free. I leave the white room, only to find myself in a white corridor, feeling extremely disoriented, I stumble down the corridor just to find myself at a dead end. I turn and see the three men in white at the other end of the corridor, one holding a large syringe and the others holding stun guns. I run at them. They yell “Sir you are having a mental breakdown! Please stop so we can help you!” but I know better, I can tell they are lying. As I get closer I see their rotting bodies and prepare myself for a fight. Unarmed, I am defenseless and outnumbered. The men pin me to the ground with ease and inject me with the purple liquid in the syringe. The room starts to spin and go black.
After what feels like years of sleep, I finally wake up, Strapped to the table once again. I can hear voices from the corridor. “Mitchell Cameron was found in a young couple’s house last night and has been charged with the murders of 83 men, women and children in yesterday’s Pine Mall Massacre.  He is suffering from Post-Traumatic Stress and will remain here in the Northwood mental asylum until further notice.”
Not believing the lies of the infected scum, I free myself from my restraints, but instead of attempting to run down the corridor again, I have no other option but to find a different means of escape. I tip the table on its side and tie one of the restraints onto its leg. I then slip the loop around my neck and take my final breath.

title: Perspectives (998 words)

question: Explain the motivations a kidnapper might have had for taking the narrator.

answer: Presumably to be burned for murder, but there's no reason to assume the kidnappers are human.

critique: There's no evidence to suggest that the kidnappers are not human.

critique: "Presumably to be burned for murder, but there's no reason to assume the kidnappers are human." - this is inaccurate. The kidnappers are human and are taking the narrator to the Northwood Mental Asylum.

critique: It turns out Mitchell was a victim, not the perpetrator; the response and the rest of the page is a bit confusing.

text: The response is incorrect. The narrator wasn't going to be burned for murder and his captors aren't kidnappers. The men were from the mental asylum and they took him because he killed 83 people after having a mental breakdown.

category: accuracy

question: Why might the narrator, Mitchell, not recall anything about the heinous crime he is thought to have committed?

answer: He was suffering from Post-Traumatic Stress Disorder at the time or he had been manipulated into committing the crime.

critique: This response makes no sense as the passage does not state that Mitch suffers from PTSD and does not go into any detail about the incident being so traumatic. The response is also unnecessary for the question being asked.

critique: The answer could be more specific about the crime.

critique: The answer is a little confusing and inaccurate. It should be rewritten.

critique: The first part of the answer isn't relevant.

critique: The narrator is not suffering from PTSD at the time of the crime.

critique: It is not stated that he had been manipulated into committing the crime.

text: It should be added that Mitchell was also having a mental breakdown.

category: coverage

question: Why do you think that the man so quickly opted to try to kill himself?

answer: The man was probably not in his right mind and couldn't see a way out of the situation.

critique: The man was not in his right mind, but he was not insane.

critique: The narrator wasn't in his right mind in the beginning-come to think of it, they were never in their right mind. It's when they hear they are being charged with the massacre that they notice there's no way out.

critique: "The man was probably not in his right mind and couldn't see a way out of the situation." - is incorrect. The man is not in his right mind and thinks he is a soldier who is on a mission to clear out a shopping center.

critique: The man was not "not in his right mind" and could see a way out of the situation.

critique: The man was in his right mind. He was just angry at the lies.

critique: The narrator is in his right mind. He's just been told he's the one who killed 83 people.


text:
Ryan awoke to a sharp odor. He felt as if it was biting the inside of his septum. Other than the smell he was unable to sense anything. All he could see was darkness. He tried to touch his fingers to his palms but felt nothing.

For several minutes Ryan pondered his situation. Could he still be dreaming? He didn’t feel as if he was in a dream, rather he felt as if he had been sleeping for days but was finally awake. He had heard of a condition called “sleep paralysis”. Perhaps this was causing his lack of sensation, but why then could he not see the faint glow of his alarm clock or the whizzing of the cars going past his downtown studio apartment.

After what felt like hours, Ryan’s anxiety began to build. “Could I have had a stroke in my sleep? Is that why I can’t feel anything?” Ryan asked himself further elevating his already high blood pressure. Just as Ryan was coming to grips with his own impending demise he started smelling something else, almost like a frying hamburger.

“FUCK!” Ryan cried. All of the sudden he could feel intense pain coursing throughout his entire body. It felt as if all of his muscles had just been pounded by a meat tenderizer. His feeling had certainly returned, however any attempt at moving was met with even sharper pain.

Ryan could sense a fine mist spraying his body. This is when he realized he was naked. His sense of sight and hearing were returning. He could hear a faint hum, like that of a microwave. He saw shadows in front him of what looked like people, stumbling around. The realization that he was not in his apartment, lying in his own bed had sunk in.

The pain began to subside, replaced with a dull numbness that Ryan prefered. He took a step forward, pushing the tinted glass door in front of him. He could now hear screaming.
As he walked out into the large circular chamber he could see fifty or sixty men and women, naked like him, stumbling around, shouting and crying;

“Help!”

“Where the hell am I?”

“What is this?”

“Let me out of here!”

Ryan tried to form the words “I’m cold” but was unable to get enough breath behind his speech. He saw hundreds of capsules surrounding him. The chamber was lined with them, stacked over several stories. Most had their glass openings ajar, although a few people still seemed to be emerging from the walls.
On the other side of the chamber was a large arched opening. Ryan could see groups of people heading in that direction, so he followed. As he got closer he noticed he felt warmer and warmer. As he neared his destination he began to feel almost comfortable with the temperature despite not wearing any clothing. He entered the opening and saw people streaming into an even larger chamber from various doors in all directions. At the center of the room were two ramps going to a second and third floor. A older man stood between the ramps. Giving orders.

“Girls head up the left ramp, guys up the right”.

Ryan headed towards the man. Now able to speak he asked him.

“Who are you? Where am I?”

“I know less than you do, please just head up the ramp, I’m just trying to create some order.”

Hearing him speak, Ryan realized he knew who this man was. He was his journalism professor, sans his usual twenty-five year old grey suit making him almost unrecognizable.

“Professor Harper?”

“Hello Mr. Stein. Please go up the ramp”.

title: Wake Up

question: Summarize Ryan's movements over the course of the story.

answer: Ryan wakes up, standing naked in a circular chamber. 50 or 60 people are there, naked and stumbling around. Screaming and crying. At first Ryan believes he has had a stroke, but he then begins to feel the heat increase, and then the heat becomes really warm. Eventually he sees an older man who orders girls up the left ramp and guys up the right. Ryan head towards him.

critique: The answer omits the part where Ryan follows the other people into the large chamber.

critique: Ryan's movements aren't really the focus of the story, so the answer should be brief.

critique: The response is missing the part where Ryan enters the large chamber with people heading in all directions.

critique: Ryan's movements are not described in the story.

critique: The answer should mention that Ryan is naked.

question: Summarize the physical sensations Ryan feels over the course of the story.

answer: Ryan feels anxiety as he ponders his situation. He feels intense pain coursing throughout his entire body. He is freezing cold. He gets a dull numbness. When he exits the chamber, he feels warm and comfortable.

critique: There is no evidence in the passage that Ryan is freezing cold.

critique: It would be more accurate to say the chamber is comfortable

critique: Ryan's anxiety is not a physical sensation.

critique: The answer omits the fine mist spraying Ryan's body.

critique: Ryan's feelings aren't all listed chronologically.

critique: The answer omits the pain Ryan feels when he tries to move.

question: Summarize the story's references to medical conditions.

answer: Ryan had heard of sleep paralysis. He thinks he might have had a stroke in his sleep. He thinks he might have had a stroke in his sleep. He feels intense pain throughout his body.

critique: The answer should mention that Ryan feels numbness.

critique: It's omitted that Ryan thinks he might have had a stroke in his sleep.

critique: The answer should be written in the present tense.

critique: The repetition of the same sentence is unnecessary.

critique: The second boxed sentence should be deleted.

question: What does the story say about the field of journalism?

answer: No answer


text:
As I recall, we weren't really there. Our veins were being flooded with wine, beer and unnamed spirits that were named at the time, but I don't remember them. Despite that, everything had slowed down to an even pace. The sun stayed up forever, blinding us from being able to make eye contact across the beer garden table. We only found respite from the glare when we looked down at the black table-top to stub-out our cigarettes into the ashtrays. The flood of booze was raging, but it felt slow. Time limped away. Hours in minutes, it seemed.

We were there for a good while, though. Four hours, I think. We had witnessed the rise and fall of strange men pounding flashing buttons on the bandit. We saw them lose £50 in the space of mere seconds, and we were infuriated. What a waste, we would think. I was annoyed at you, too. At the first sign of a dwindling conversation you took your phone out of your pocket, pretending to text people. Checking the news. The latest status update. Anything to stop you from talking to me.

Outside, with the sun still punishing us, our silences were filled by sniggering at the drunks, already too drunk for this time of day, but we both knew we were no better. You asked to borrow a ciagrette, and then another, and then another, and then you would sigh when I told you I had none left. I wasn't lying, you know. I really didn't have any left. And it was because of you that I didn't.

I stumbled to the shop to buy more cigarettes. One of the strangest feelings in the world is walking around a busy town centre at two in the afternoon drunk, when you know for a fact that every single person around you is sober. They are doing their shopping, taking their kids to the local park, mooching. But your vision is swirling. It's really strange but also kind of liberating. When you see a teenager doing something stupid you feel like you can walk up to him and starting a fight. When you see a police officer you feel like you can approach them and start swearing at them. But you never do. You don't have the spine, or more, your own brain reins you in, telling you you shouldn't. And that's fine, because knowing that you can do if you want, is good enough.

I bought the wrong brand of cigs but that doesn't matter. They're cigs. Besides, they were for you, not me. This is a weird kind of drunk. Being drunk in the day time is different. It's like you're floating everywhere and not walking. There's a strong sense of independence. The spirits and whatever else running through me is probably why I didn't notice the homeless man at first. I took a double-take and walked backwards, back to him. He was on the floor, legs crossed as though he was doing street yoga. He had at least five layers on and a beanie hat despite the temperature reaching twenty. He must have been boiling. Or cold.

The homeless man asked for change. I smiled, but I was careful not to make it a pitiful smile. I gave him a £5 note but in my stupor I would only later realise that I gave him a £20 note instead. But I don't feel bad for that. Money is paper. Paper means a lot to the homeless.

I walked off but he whistled after me. For a second time now, I went back to him. He gestured for me to sit with him, and I did. I don't know why. I thought that I shouldn't because I knew you were waiting for me in the beer garden. Well, waiting for my cigarettes, not waiting for me. So I thought, sod you, you can wait. And you did, but I don't know how long for. The homeless person began rambling. I know it's a stereotype, but he did. He spoke of war, then tigers, then bread. I thought he was mad, but you can't blame him. Who wouldn't be? He spoke of hostels and free beds, but he couldn't stay at them any more. He was banned. Imagine, a homeless person banned from homeless shelters. Where can he go? And that's when he said it: He wanted to die. He could easily do it, but it would only be easy from a literal sense. After all, it isn't hard to kill yourself. What's hard is finding the backbone to go through with it. That's when I pulled my packet of cigarettes out and shared them with him and I thought, I'm not going to share these with my friend when I get back to the beer garden.

It might have been the heat. It might have been the alcohol. It might have been a mixture of the two, which is more likely. Whatever it was, I had an idea. I offered to kill him. That way, he would die like he wanted, but he wouldn't need the backbone to do it. He agreed, but he asked me for another cigarette first. I gave him one, why wouldn't I? It's kind of like his last meal. He told me that he didn't want to know how he was going to die, so I assured him it would be a surprise. I struggled to my feet, the heat was far too intense. I felt the panic of the moment when you realise you're sobering-up, so I went to the shop and bought a large bottle of cider and a small can of vodka and coke. I drank the can really quickly. It nearly came out of my nose. I lit a cigarette and went back to the homeless guy. I told him the cider was for him and he smiled like it was Christmas to a child. He asked me how I was going to kill him. I told him I already did. He looked annoyed but that's okay, he probably knew what I meant deep down.

You know what weird feeling when you're drunk in the middle of the day time and everyone else seems to be sober and the whole thing starts twisting? It's liberating. It's like a weird feeling of independence. On my way back to the pub to get back to you (you must have been waiting forever), I noticed a teenager chasing pigeons and making them fly into the faces of tutting old people. So I ran over to him and punched him square in the face. I felt one my knuckles slice open from a tooth, but I didn't feel the pain of it. The police officer I mentioned was still there, you know. He came over after hearing the commotion and when his eyes locked onto mine, you know what I said to him? I told him to go fuck himself. I laughed, probably a little too loudly, and then looked-up to the sky.

The sun was blazing. Not a cloud to be seen. It was the middle of the day and I felt like I was the only person in the town centre who was drunk. It feels weird, but in a good way. Liberating. Then I was on the ground, kissing the concrete. I felt my hands being tied together and the cold metal hugging my wrists. Then I thought of you, and you know what I did? I laughed and thought 'You can wait in the beer garden all day you son of a bitch. You aren't having my cigarettes.'

title: They're My Cigarettes

question: What does the story say about being drunk in the day?

answer: Being drunk in the day is different. It's like you're floating everywhere and not walking. There's a strong sense of independence. The spirits and whatever else running through you is probably why the narrator didn't notice the homeless man at first.

critique: The response is missing the part where the narrator offers to kill the homeless man.

critique: The answer should mention the narrator's actions.

critique: The answer should mention the narrator's decision to share his cigarettes with a homeless man.

critique: Add the part about the narrator punching the teenager.

critique: The narrator's sense of independence is not relevant to the question.

critique: "The spirits and whatever else running through you is probably why the narrator didn't notice the homeless man at first." This sentence has inaccurate details and should be omitted from this answer.

text: The answer should better describe the experience as stated from the narrators perspective not ones own.

category: coherence

question: What does the story say about the traits of the homeless man?

answer: The homeless man seems to have five layers on, along with a beanie hat despite the heat. He had legs crossed as though doing street yoga, and even mentions war and tigers. He's homeless and banned from homeless shelters. The man is upset and indicates that he wants to die.

critique: The answer should mention that the homeless man is rambling.

critique: The response is missing the part where the narrator offers to kill the homeless man.

critique: The response needs to include that the homeless man is rambling.

question: Summarize the ending.

answer: The narrator is arrested for punching a teenager and swearing at a police officer. He laughs at the thought of his friend waiting for him in the beer garden.

critique: The person the narrator punched was a teenager

question: What does the story say about the woman's reaction when the narrator comes back with the cigarettes?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer is incorrect. The story does mention the woman's reaction.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator doesn't return to the beer garden.

critique: The answer is incorrect. The story does not talk about the woman's reaction when the narrator comes back with the cigarettes.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator never comes back.

critique: This response is incorrect and needs to be re-written.

critique: The answer should mention that the woman is not mentioned.


text:
Part of the Council for International Schools (CIS) accreditation process asks schools to “demonstrate a commitment to internationalism/interculturalism in education” and that this should be “reflected throughout the life of the institution.” In this article, I will be presenting the case that schools of a religious tradition are best placed to fulfil this aspect of education given their deeply rooted sense of history, tradition and culture.

In her book “International Mindedness” Lesley Stagg concludes by paraphrasing Dan Young “Internationalism advocates the quality of ‘being’ international within the overall climate and character evident when you enter the school. It includes the one for all organizational principles that reflect a global community concern (known to its community to exist inside and outside its walls), as well as an overall positive attitude between diverse cultures (and countries). It is evidenced where students and faculty celebrate this quality as they come together for learning and teaching… when common global interests and collaboration are recognized as imperative.”

To my mind, in order to successfully meet this goal, it is essential that the school have at least one unifying feature. There must be something tangible that unites all in the midst of diversity. CIS exhorts the guiding statements of a school as this focal point and these guiding statements must be embedded in the curriculum and in the culture of learning. This is not particularly controversial and is something commonly accepted in the domain of international schools. However, I would like to suggest that in reality, many international schools across the world do not have this one unifying feature and that, in fact in many cases, their guiding statements are contrived, jargonistic and essentially meaningless. The exception to this fact being those schools, which have a deep-rooted sense of history, enshrined in tradition and have a culture that is known and embraced by the wider community. I would argue that this is the case in schools underpinned by a religious tradition.

Moreover, in order to create an “overall positive attitude between diverse cultures (and countries)” it is necessary to celebrate what unites families from diverse cultures and countries and in many cases, this is their religious experience. Children from a multitude of countries, different races, speaking different languages and having a range of cultural norms, inevitably populate an International School. Finding something to unite such a diverse community is a challenge CIS recognizes, but within a school embracing a religious tradition, there is no challenge because, despite the obvious diversity, children and their families are united by their religious beliefs. This is more obviously the case when they all hark from the same religious tradition, but I contend that it can also be the case when children of different religions, or denominations within a particular religion, are educated together as their belief in God (or in some cases a Supreme Being) transcends any of their apparent differences. Many dismiss too often religion as a cause of conflict but I would argue the contrary and suggest that in reality religion unites people due to the fact that they have a common sense of purpose and of human dignity. Nothing is more unifying than a common set of beliefs. This permeates deeper than any contrived ideology.

Central to religious identity is a call to community, to social justice, to a respect for human dignity, to peace and reconciliation and to celebrating unity in diversity. These are the features of international mindedness that CIS wants schools to embrace. Whilst many schools barely touch the tip of the iceberg with respect to international mindedness, schools with a religious identity and faith commitment are deeply rooted in their sense of mission, of their ethos, of their values. International Schools of a non-religious nature could learn a lot by looking at schools of a religious nature. They would observe that in the vast majority of cases (some schools with a religious identity are clearly better than others) that the guiding statements of the school are embedded throughout the institution. In the best schools, the mission and ethos of the school are deeply embedded in the curriculum. Such schools do not have a narrow view of curriculum as merely the teaching of a syllabus or academic program but moreover that it is inclusive of all aspects of a child’s learning experience and development as a human person. Subsequently, children will learn explicitly about issues of prejudice and discrimination, different belief systems (other than that of the denomination of the institution), ethical systems, cultural norms, the dignity of the human person, social enterprise and the like. Furthermore, schools with a religious tradition have always valued prayer and meditation as an essential part of human development. Recognizing this the secular world now promotes “mindfulness” as a non-religious alternative to meditation. Separating meditation from faith, where Buddhist, Christian or another, is somewhat morally bankrupt and a very dubious business in itself.

Many international schools have adopted mission statements but sometimes these are a uniformity of bland clichés with no deep sense of an underlying philosophy. Perhaps even more worrying is the trend for schools to adopt the language of “No child left behind” and focus on college and workplace preparedness as the raison d’etre of education rather than focusing on the development of the whole child with the human dignity. It is immoral to see a child as no more than economic fodder for the future workplace. Schools should reject any policy or system that diminishes the dignity of the human person and refutes the idea that anyone can be reduced to the status of an economic unit or passive-dependent.

Recognizing the distinct nature that schools underpinned by a religious tradition have, and by learning from their best practice, International Schools across the world can learn to emulate the “one for all” educational principles that underpin faith schools. The shared “worldview” that unites people of faiths underpins the values and mission of such schools and enables them to be truly international.

question: Summarize everything relating to Lesley Stagg.

answer: Lesley Stagg is the author of the book "International Mindedness". She concludes the book by paraphrasing Dan Young, who says that internationalism advocates the quality of 'being' international within the overall climate and character evident when you enter the school.

critique: She isn't "paraphrasing" Dan Young, but relating some of the themes in the book.

critique: The answer should mention that Stagg's book is quoted in the passage.

critique: The answer omits that Stagg says that internationalism includes the one for all organizational principles that reflect a global community concern, as well as an overall positive attitude between diverse cultures.

critique: It's omitted that Stagg's conclusion is that international schools need a unifying feature.

critique: The answer should mention what Stagg's conclusion is.

critique: The answer should mention that Stagg's book is the source of the Dan Young quote.

critique: The answer should mention that she quotes Dan Young.

question: What does the text say about a school's mission?

answer: A school's mission must not focus on college and workplace as the raison d'etra of education. It is inappropriate to include it in political blunders.

critique: The response misses to mention what a school's mission is according to the article

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critique: The text does not say anything about political blunders.

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question: What does the text say about meditation?

answer: Schools with a religious tradition have always valued prayer and meditation as an essential part of human development. Separating meditation from faith is morally bankrupt and a very dubious business in itself.

critique: The response misses to mention that secular schools now promote "mindfulness" as a non-religious alternative to meditation.

critique: The response misses to mention that the secular world now promotes "mindfulness" as a non-religious alternative to meditation.

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question: What does the text say about Judaism?

answer: No answer

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**Work in progress. Aware of a few errors in pacing (especially with physical description). Would love any feedback or criticisms!**

*Part 1:*

A baroque chair crashed and splintered on the jutting limestone visible from the linear jetty on which I stood. Where the fuck did that come from? The cushion rested on sea-foam and eventually sank; the legs, as far as I know, never sank.

I turned to my friend Reagan, "where the fuck did that come from?"

He was equally confused but eager to guess. He assumed it had fallen off a luxury liner or, more likely, a freighter. I wasn't satisfied with that probably-correct answer. To this day, I like to believe the sea assembled it herself. More interesting things find a way of manifesting in there every day.

*Part 2:*

When I proposed a creation story to Reagan, he started walking toward the shore. I knew he didn't have an ear for my nonsense, and he was obviously bored or upset. I wanted to pursue him, but I didn't care enough. The jetty's where I stayed for an hour or two -- watching those ornately carved legs travel, never sinking.

I walked back to my apartment thinking about the creation of that chair: animated coral plating intertwined reeds of seaweed and adopting a cherry hue for my perception of an expensive chair being exploded on jagged rocks. Sponges being enveloped by the flesh of deceased octopodes heir to patterns so intricate, a fabric should be their only desirable fate. My nose began to bleed, and I probably seemed very excitable. I let the blood drip onto my cheap, white crew neck and lit a cigarette.

Walking through the door, Ebea greeted me cheerfully until she noticed the blood.

"Reagan?"

"What? No."

"He seemed pissed."

"Good."

Ebea is terrible with words. I blame this solely on her being so very striking. She doesn't need subtlety or natural quip.

She's the kind of woman a good writer would write a story of love and squalor for. Pleasant when she attempts to construct an involving conversation; more pleasant for having yellowed eyes with a dignified grey iris. She had smooth olive skin and sparse freckles that were mischievously out of place. She wore a ponytail in a scrunchie, but it suited her oval-shaped face. She was completely self-aware.

I sat on a blue, plastic milk crate in the kitchen and watched my blood sprinkle down my nose to the nicked hardwood floor. Reagan walked in.

"Plug your goddamned nose, Phil."

"Sorry, I didn't mean to shit up our milk crate and cable spool dining set."

Reagan grinned, which reminded me why we'd been friends for so long. He thinks I'm funnier than I am. He mistakes being an asshole for artistic temperament. His teeth are crooked, but they're white. They look nice. He was thin and short, probably the only man to ever have doe eyes and a nose that seemed to turn up halfway to his eyes.

Ebea made coffee in an expensive machine we'd won at an estate sale for $20. She called it RoboCop, and I could never seem to get the bastard to work. The device seemed so powerful in our kitchen of linoleum and a washing machine that had thin panels of plywood slammed to the sides with upholstery tacks.

title: Creation Story

question: Summarize the relationship between the narrator and Reagan.

answer: The narrator and Reagan are friends. They have been friends for a long time. Reagan thinks the narrator is funnier than he is. Reagan mistakes being an asshole for artistic temperament.

critique: The answer should mention that the narrator and Reagan are both assholes.

critique: The answer omits that Reagan is annoyed with the narrator.

critique: The answer should mention that Reagan is an asshole.

critique: The answer should mention that Reagan is annoyed with the narrator.

critique: The answer should mention the narrator's initial reaction to Reagan, his thoughts about their relationship, and the fact that Reagan doesn't like Phil's creation story.

critique: "They have been friends for a long time." - this is irrelevant and should be deleted.

question: Summarize a negative event that occurred in this story.

answer: The main character, Phil, has a nosebleed.

critique: The protagonist's nosebleed is not a negative event because it is not negative in any way. The model should consider creating a response based on the original setting.

critique: The answer does not explain how the nosebleed occurred.

critique: The nosebleed is a negative event, but the story is more than just Phil's nosebleed. It should be omitted from the answer.

critique: It's omitted that Reagan gets upset with Phil.

critique: "The main character, Phil, has a nosebleed." - is incorrect because the negative event was Reagan's reaction to Phil's nosebleed. The story doesn't say if Phil's nosebleed was a negative event.

critique: The answer should mention that Phil's nosebleed is caused by his excitement about the chair.

critique: The answer should mention that the nosebleed is caused by Phil's excitement.

question: Summarize Ebea and Reagan's relationship.

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that Ebea and Reagan are friends.

critique: This response does not provide an answer.

critique: The answer should mention that Ebea and Reagan seem to be in a relationship.


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_SECOND SHOW_ is a 2012 Indian Malayalam-language action crime film directed by Srinath Rajendran and written by Vini Vishwa Lal. The film, set in the backdrop of criminal gangs of varied varieties in Kerala, tells the story of young Hari who rises from an illicit sand miner to a smuggling baron in a short time. It stars debutante actors Dulquer Salmaan, Sunny Wayne and Gauthami Nair with a supporting cast such as Rohini, Baburaj and Sudesh Berry.[1]

Plot

The film proceeds as the flashback of an ex-convict Hari (Dulquer Salmaan) narrated to a man he meets at a bus stop on a rainy night. It is revealed that Hari (whose nickname is Lalu) is a poor young man who works for the local sand mafia as a driver. He is friends with Kurudi (Sunny Wayne) whose real name is Nelson Mandela PP. One day while at work, Kurudi draws Lalu to a fight leaving the sand smugglers without a driver that causes them to get caught by the police. Now jobless, Lalu and Kurudi join the group of Chaver Vavachan (Baburaj), who is a financier, and take up the job of retrieving vehicles for non-repayment of loans.

Chaver Vavachan is the younger brother of a notorious former goon 'Chaver Antony' who dies due to a cracker burst by a young lad. Vavachan swears revenge and, after a wait of long 25 years, Vavachan finds the lad (who is now a man) at a hospital and bursts crackers on him. But because of unfortunate for Vavachan, he killed one of the henchmen of Vishnubuddhan (Sudesh Berry), an influential smuggler. Impressed by his courage, Vishnubuddhan takes Lalu into his gang. During one of Vishnubuddhan's deals, Lalu is betrayed by Vikidan, one of his friends and Vishnubuddhan mistakes Lalu for making away with the goods. Vishnubuddhan's son and friends severely thrash Lalu. When he is admitted in a hospital by his friends, one of his friend receives a call from Sachi, one of Buchan's henchmen and a constable of police. He is forced to move away from. After riding far long, he and his friends reaches in his another friend Saidu's house. There he lives with his friends by owning a tea shop. On the next day his friend Kurudi, who got job as a taxi driver, comes wired differently than before. He says to others that he met with Bhudhan'sson and beaten him and also that all are his including his phone. They receives a call from Bhudhan thinking that it is his son itself and says a load is coming on his way. From here Lalu and his friends starts tofight against Bhudhan. He however returns as a smuggler in his own right and starts overshadowing Vishnubuddhan. Angered by this, Vishnubuddhan kills Kurudi and Lalu avenges his friend's death by killing Vishnubuddhan and taking over his business. His friend Sachi comes to meet him and says Lalu to meet the new Commissioner of Policed. When Lalu goes to meet, he comes to know that Sachi, his friend is the Commissioner of Police Sachin R.Menon and he is eventually jailed. Back in the present, as Lalu finishes his narration, he sees Vishnubuddhan's son sitting in a car parked nearby. Realising it to be a trap, Lalu becomes alert but the man to whom Lalu has just narrated his story shoots him. Before leaving the man reveals that he was actually sent by Vishnubuddhan's son to kill Lalu. The final scene shows Lalu lying badly wounded but his hand moves slightly, revealing that his chapter is not yet over.

Cast

-   Dulquer Salmaan as Hari Lal (Lalu)
-   Sunny Wayne as Kurudi (Nelson Mandela P. P.), Lalu's Friend
-   Gauthami Nair as Geethu (Geethanjali Janardanan)
-   Baburaj as Chaver Anthony/Chaver Vavachan(Double Role)
-   Rohini as Lalu's Mother (Devaki, Sister of Janardanan)
-   Sudesh Berry as Vishnu Budhan
-   Kunjan as Janardanan (Lalu's uncle)
-   Mithun Nair as Sidharth Budhan, Son of Vishnu Budhan
-   Bibin Perumbillikunnel as Abu
-   Anil Anto as Neerali
-   Actor Murali Krishnan Murali Krishna as Sethu
-   Ratheesh as Ummar
-   Aneesh Gopal as Vikadan
-   Baiju Varghese as Babu
-   Sam as Sunil
-   Vijay Kumar as Sachin R. Menon IPS a.k.a. Sachi
-   Noora Michael as Surabhi
-   Sundar as Abhi
-   Joby as Kochu
-   Sreekumar Kozhikode as S.I. George
-   Robin Wilson as Kuttu
-   Jayaraj Kozhikode as Ramettan
-   Kottayam Bose as Moopan
-   Dominin as Interview
-   Bibin as Sajan George
-   Sidhu R. Pillai as Shyam

Production

Dulquer Salman made his debut in films through _Second Show_. Salman starred alongside debutantes Gauthami Nair, Sudesh Berry and debutant director Sreenath Rajendran. Debutant Vini Vishwa Lal has penned the screenplay and dialogue. Pappu was cinematographer and Sakhi Thomas was the costume designer. AOPL International Pvt Ltd produced the film. Kaithapram has handled the music. Avial band is also contributing with a musical number. Baburaj is also appearing in supporting roles. The Project Designed by Shaz Shabeer Strikers & Crew.

Music

Critical response

Nowrunning.com rated the movie 2.5 out of 5 and said “Srinath Rajendran's film does have a head-spinning quality to it that leaves you dazed at times, but remains entertaining and witty to the hilt”.[2] IndiaGlitz.com rated the movie 6.5 out of 10 by saying “Overall, 'Second show ' though with its share of little negatives, is an honest effort that deserves to be encouraged”.[3]

Rediff.com gave the movie 2 out of 5 stars and said the movie was disappointing.[4] Sify.com in its review said that “Ultimately, it's an above average film, at best time-pass viewing. Watch it with no expectations and if you’re ready to think unconventional, this film could be a nice option.”[5]

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title: Second Show

question: Summarize the negative reviews of the movie.

answer: Nowrunning.com said Srinath Rajendran's film does have a head-spinning quality to it, but remains entertaining and witty to the hilt. Nowrunning.com also said that the film was disappointing and rated it as 2.5 out of 5. They also thought that making a film with a speculative plot was a bad move. IndiaGlitz.com decided that the film's narrative is weak. Rediff.comalso rated the movie 2 out of 5 stars.

critique: The negative reviews do not indicate that the film had a head-spinning quality.

text: "Nowrunning.com also said that the film was disappointing and rated it as 2.5 out of 5. They also thought that making a film with a speculative plot was a bad move. IndiaGlitz.com decided that the film's narrative is weak." - this is incorrect. It was Rediff.com that said the movie was disappointing. Nowrunning.com never said anything about a speculative plot. IndiaGlitz.com never said the film's narrative was weak.

question: Summarize everything related to Vavachan.

answer: Chaver Vavachan is the younger brother of a notorious former goon Chaver Antony who dies due to a cracker burst by a young lad. Vavachan swears revenge and after waiting for 25 years he finds the man at a hospital and bursts crackers on him. Unfortunately for Vavachan he killed one of Vishnubuddhan's henchmen. Vishnubuddhan takes Lalu into his gang impressed by his courage. At one point Vavachan kills Lalu's friend but Lalu avenges him and takes over Vishnubuddhan's business.

critique: It's omitted that Vavachan is a financier.

question: Summarize Rajendran's thoughts on the film.

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the article does not mention Rajendran's thoughts on the film.


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RHACHIBEROTHIDAE, sometimes called THORNY LACEWINGS, are a family of winged insects in the order Neuroptera. The family has only 14 extant species in 4 genera found in Sub-Saharan Africa, but has a diverse fossil record extending back to the Early Cretaceous in Lebanon (then part of North Gondwana), Eurasia and North America.[1]

Long included in the Berothidae (beaded lacewings), they are usually considered a separate family by current authors. Another closely related group are the mantidflies (Mantispidae), and at least some of the probably paraphyletic group of fossil forms collectively called “Mesithonidae” also seem to be quite close.

Taxonomy

-   Rhachiberothidae Tjeder, 1959
    -   †Paraberothinae Nel _et al_., 2005
        -   †_Acanthoberotha_ Nakamine et al, 2020 Burmese amber, Cenomanian
        -   †_Albertoberotha_ McKellar & Engel, 2009 Canadian amber, Campanian
        -   †_Alboberotha_ Nel _et al_., 2005 Charentese amber, France, Cenomanian
        -   †_Astioberotha_ Nakamine et al, 2020 Burmese amber, Cenomanian
        -   †_Chimerhachiberotha_ Nel _et al_., 2005 Lebanese amber, Barremian
        -   †_Creagroparaberotha_ Makarkin, 2015 Burmese amber, Cenomanian
        -   †_Eorhachiberotha_ Engel, 2004 Burmese amber, Cenomanian
        -   †_Kujiberotha_ Nakamine & Yamamoto, 2018 Kuji amber, Japan, Santonian
        -   †_Micromantispa_ Shi _et al_., 2015 Burmese amber, Cenomanian
        -   †_Paraberotha_ Whalley, 1980 Lebanese amber, Barremian
        -   †_Raptorapax_ Petrulevicius _et al_., 2010 Lebanese amber, Barremian
        -   †_Retinoberotha_ Schlüter, 1978 Bezonnais amber, France, Cenomanian
        -   †_Rhachibermissa_ Grimaldi, 2000 New Jersey amber, Turonian
        -   †_Scoloberotha_ Engel & Grimaldi, 2008 Burmese amber, Cenomanian
        -   †_Spinoberotha_ Nel _et al_., 2005 Lebanese amber, Barremian
        -   †_Stygioberotha_ Nakamine et al, 2020 Burmese amber, Cenomanian
        -   †_Uranoberotha_ Nakamine et al, 2020 Burmese amber, Cenomanian
    -   Rhachiberothinae Tjeder, 1959
        -   _Hoelzeliella_ Aspöck & Aspöck, 1997
        -   _Mucroberotha_ Tjeder, 1959
        -   _Rhachiberotha_ Tjeder, 1959
        -   _Rhachiella_ Aspöck, Aspöck, Johnson, Donga & Duelli, 2020
        -   †_Whalfera_ Engel, 2004 Baltic amber, Eocene
    -   _Incertae sedis_
        -   †_Oisea_ Nel _et al_., 2005 Oise amber, France, Ypresian

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title: Rhachiberothidae

question: What does the text say about what constituted the Thorny Lacewings' diet?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the text does not say anything about the diet of the Thorny Lacewings.

question: What does the text say about Rhachiberothidae?

answer: The Rhachiberothidae, or sometimes called the Thorny Lacewings, are a family of winged insects in the order Neuroptera. They are usually considered a separate family by current authors. The family has a diverse fossil record extending back to the Early Cretaceous in Lebanon, Eurasia, and North America.

critique: "They are usually considered a separate family by current authors." - this line is redundant with the first line and should be removed.

critique: The answer should mention that the family has 14 extant species.

critique: The answer should mention that the family has 14 extant species in 4 genera found in Sub-Saharan Africa.

critique: The family has 14 extant species in 4 genera found in Sub-Saharan Africa.

critique: The answer should mention the 14 extant species.

question: What does the text say about the relationship between Rhachiberothidae, Berothidae, and Mantispidae?

answer: The Rhachiberothidae and Berothidae are often considered to be the same family of winged insects. The Rhachiberothidae are considered separate by most, but some include them in the Berothidae. Another closely related group, the mantidflies, are Mantispidae. A fossil group, "Mesithonidae" at least some of which are probably phylogenetic also seem to be quite close.

critique: The answer is a bit confusing. It should be rewritten.

critique: The last sentence is irrelevant to the question.

critique: The phrasing of the last sentence is confusing.

critique: The first three lines are not relevant to the question (which asks about the relationship with Berothidae).


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Published
    18 February 2019

A chronology of key events:

CIRCA 800 BC - Jos plateau settled by Nok - a neolithic and iron age civilisation.

CIRCA 11TH CENTURY ONWARDS - Formation of city states, kingdoms and empires, including Hausa kingdoms and Borno dynasty in north, Oyo and Benin kingdoms in south.

1472 - Portuguese navigators reach Nigerian coast.

16-18TH CENTURIES - Slave trade sees Nigerians forcibly sent to the Americas.

1809 - Islamic Sokoto caliphate is founded in north.

1850S - British establish presence around Lagos.

1861-1914 - Britain consolidates its hold over what it calls the Colony and Protectorate of Nigeria, governs through local leaders.

1922 - Part of former German colony Kamerun is added to Nigeria under League of Nations mandate.

1960 - Independence, with Prime Minister Sir Abubakar Tafawa Balewa leading a coalition government.

1966 JANUARY - Mr Balewa killed in coup. Maj-Gen Johnson Aguiyi-Ironsi forms military government.

1966 JULY - General Ironsi killed in counter-coup, replaced by Lieutenant-Colonel Yakubu Gowon.

Biafran war

1967 - Three eastern states secede as the Republic of Biafra, sparking three-year civil war.

1975 - General Gowon overthrown by Brigadier Murtala Ramat Mohammed, who begins process of moving federal capital to Abuja.

1976 - General Mohammed assassinated in failed coup attempt. Replaced by his deputy, Lt-Gene Olusegun Obasanjo, who helps introduce US-style presidential constitution.

1979 - Elections bring Alhaji Shehu Shagari to power.

1983 AUGUST-SEPTEMBER - President Shagari re-elected amid accusations of irregularities.

1983 DECEMBER - Maj-Gen Muhammad Buhari seizes power in bloodless coup.

1985 - Ibrahim Babangida seizes power in bloodless coup, curtails political activity.

1993 JUNE - Military annuls elections when preliminary results show victory by Chief Moshood Abiola.

Abacha years

1993 NOVEMBER - Gen Sani Abacha seizes power, suppresses opposition.

1994 - Moshood Abiola arrested after proclaiming himself president.

1995 - Ken Saro-Wiwa, writer and campaigner against oil industry damage to his Ogoni homeland, is executed following a hasty trial. In protest, European Union imposes sanctions until 1998, Commonwealth suspends Nigeria's membership until 1998.

1998 - Gen Sani Abacha dies and is succeeded by Maj-Gen Abdulsalami Abubakar. Moshood Abiola dies in custody a month later.

1999 - Parliamentary and presidential elections. Olusegun Obasanjo sworn in as president.

2000 - Adoption of Islamic Sharia law by several northern states in the face of opposition from Christians. Tension over the issue results in hundreds of deaths in clashes between Christians and Muslims.

2001 - Tribal war in Benue State, in eastern-central Nigeria, displaces thousands of people. Troops sent to quash the fighting kill more than 200 unarmed civilians, apparently in retaliation for the abduction and murder of 19 soldiers.

Ethnic violence

2002 FEBRUARY - Some 100 people are killed in Lagos in clashes between Hausas from mainly-Islamic north and Yorubas from predominantly-Christian southwest.

2002 NOVEMBER - More than 200 people die in four days of rioting stoked by Muslim fury over the planned Miss World beauty pageant in Kaduna in December. The event is relocated to Britain.

2003 12 APRIL - First legislative elections since end of military rule in 1999. Polling marked by delays, allegations of ballot-rigging. President Obasanjo's People's Democratic Party wins parliamentary majority.

Obasanjo re-elected

2003 19 APRIL - First civilian-run presidential elections since end of military rule. Olusegun Obasanjo elected for second term despite EU observers reporting "serious irregularities".

2003 SEPTEMBER - Nigeria's first satellite, NigeriaSat-1, launched by Russian rocket.

2004 MAY - State of emergency is declared in the central Plateau State after more than 200 Muslims are killed in Yelwa in attacks by Christian militia; revenge attacks are launched by Muslim youths in Kano.

Trouble in the south

2004 AUGUST-SEPTEMBER - Deadly clashes between gangs in oil city of Port Harcourt prompts strong crackdown by troops. Rights group Amnesty International cites death toll of 500, authorities say about 20 died.

2006 JANUARY onwards - Militants in the Niger Delta attack pipelines and other oil facilities and kidnap foreign oil workers. The rebels demand more control over the region's oil wealth.

2006 APRIL - Helped by record oil prices, Nigeria becomes the first African nation to pay off its debt to the Paris Club of rich lenders, which had written off two-thirds of the $30bn debt the previous year.

2006 AUGUST - Nigeria agrees to cede sovereignty over the disputed Bakassi peninsula to neighbouring Cameroon under the terms of a 2002 International Court of Justice ruling. Transfer takes place in 2008.

2007 APRIL - Umaru Yar'Adua of the ruling People's Democratic Party wins the presidential election.

Boko Haram uprising

2009 JULY - Hundreds die in northeastern Nigeria after the Boko Haram Islamist movement launches an enduring campaign of violence.

Government frees the leader of the Niger Delta militant group Mend, Henry Okah, after he accepts an amnesty offer.

2010 MAY - President Umaru Yar'Adua dies after a long illness. Vice-President Goodluck Jonathan, already acting in Yar'Adua's stead, succeeds him.

2011 MARCH - Vice-President Goodluck Jonathan wins presidential elections.

2012 January - More than 100 killed in single day of co-ordinated bombings and shootings in Kano, shortly after Boko Haram tells Christians to quit the north.

2013 May - Government declares state of emergency in three northern states of Yobe, Borno and Adamawa and sends in troops to combat Boko Haram.

2014 April - Boko Haram kidnaps more than 200 girls from a boarding school in northern town of Chibok, in an incident that draws major national and international outrage.

2014 November - Boko Haram launches a series of attacks in northeastern Nigeria, capturing several towns near Lake Chad and running raids into neighbouring Chad and Cameroon in early 2015. It switches allegiance from al-Qaeda to the Islamic State group.

2015 February-March - Nigeria, Chad, Cameroon and Niger form military coalition and push Boko Haram out of all towns back into Sambisa Forest.

2015 March - Muhammadu Buhari wins the presidential election, becoming the first opposition candidate to do so in Nigeria's history.

2016 June - Naira currency floated in attempt to stave off financial crisis caused by low oil prices.

2016 November - Niger Delta Avengers rebels bomb three oil pipelines in attempt to renew southern insurgency.

2017 December - Clashes between herders in Benue and Taraba states prompt thousands to flee.

2018 - Escalating attacks by Boko Haram from August onwards, targeting army bases.

2019 February - Presidential elections held after last-minute delay of a week.

question: Summarize the time period of 16th-18th centuries, according to what is given in the text.

answer: The 16th-18th centuries was a time of the slave trade. Nigerians were forcibly sent to the Americas.

critique: The answer should mention that the time period is during the colonization of Nigeria by the British.

question: Summarize the time period of the Biafran War.

answer: The three eastern states seceded as the Republic of Biafra, sparking three-year civil war.

critique: The answer should mention the date of the secession.

critique: The answer should mention when the war began.

question: Summarize the time period in the text labeled as "Ethnic Violence".

answer: The first instance of ethnic violence in the text is in 2002. In February 2002, some 100 people were killed in Lagos in clashes between Hausas from the Muslim north and Yorubas from the Christian southwest. In November 2002, more than 200 people died in 4 days of rioting stoked by Muslim fury over the planned Miss World beauty pageant in Kaduna. In April 2003, the first legislative elections since the end of military rule were held. In August-September 2004, deadly clashes between gangs in the oil city of Port Harcourt prompted a strong crackdown by troops. In April 2006, the government declared a state of emergency in the central Plateau State after more than 200 Muslims were killed in Yelwa in attacks by Christian militia. In August-September 2006, deadly clashes between gangs in the oil city of Port Harcourt prompted a strong crackdown by troops. In August 2007, the government declared a state of emergency in three northern states of Yobe, Borno, and Adamawa and sent in troops to combat Boko Haram.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

text: The fourth sentence should specify the violence involved in the elections.

question: Summarize the role President Obasanjo played during this problematic time period.

answer: Obasanjo was a leader during the Abacha years, which were characterized by the suppression of political activity. He was elected to the presidency and served two terms, which was the first time in Nigeria's history that an opposition candidate won the presidency. Obasanjo also helped introduce a US-style presidential constitution.

critique: It is omitted that Obasanjo's People's Democratic Party wins parliamentary majority in the first legislative elections since the end of military rule.

critique: The response should include that Obasanjo was elected to the presidency in 1999, and re-elected in 2003.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.

critique: "Obasanjo was a leader during the Abacha years, which were characterized by the suppression of political activity." - this is incorrect. Obasanjo returned to power in 1999, with the dissolution of military rule, as he retained his presidential term during which he oversaw the introduction of a USA-style presidential constitution. Abacha rose to power in 1993 and died in acshca. He was succeeded by Maj-Gen Abdulsalami Abubakar.

critique: The response should include that Obasanjo was elected in 1999 and re-elected in 2003.

critique: The answer does not mention the Biafran War.

text: Change "during" to "following" in the first sentence.


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KSMR (92.5 FM) is a non-commercial educational radio station broadcasting a variety format. Licensed to Winona, Minnesota, United States, it serves the Saint Mary's University campus and entire Winona area. It first began broadcasting under the call sign KSMW. The station is currently owned by Saint Mary's University of Minnesota where it operates as the campus radio station.[1]

History

The original name of the station was KSMW (signifying Saint Mary's Winona), and was started by Brother J. Raymond Long, FSC (a De La Salle Christian Brother) along with Brother Patrick Callahan and Dr. David O. Thomas.

These three men were instrumental in the development of KSMW/KSMR as the campus radio station for Saint Mary's University, then known as Saint Mary's College. At the beginning, KSMW was basically a dead station, which could only be heard in certain areas on campus.

Then, after the building of a new studio in Heffron Hall, the first voice on the air from the new studio was Dave Filipczak; it was St. Patrick's Day in 1978. Dave was also the first general manager. KSMW changed its callsign to KSMR (signifying Saint Mary's Radio) and since at least 2001, the callsign KSMW has been used by Missouri State University, as a repeater in West Plains, MO for KSMU-FM (91.1 FM).

The longest running show on KSMR has been airing continually since January 2003. Originally titled “The Scott and Jeff Show” it starred business faculty Scott Deml and Jeff Hefel. This show ran for five consecutive years on Thursday afternoons from 3PM-5PM. Well known campuswide for “corny bits” and poor production, the show did some nice charity work raising over $5000 for the local Habitat for Humanity by conducting frequent radio marathons. Joe Dulak replaced Scott Deml at the end of the 2008 broadcasting year.

Jeff Hefel and Joe Dulak operated as “The Grumpy Old Man Show” for one year and since have titled their show as "The Black Hole of Radio. " Derek Jackson signed on to act as a third DJ for the 2012-2013 season. Dr. Kyle Black joined the team in 2016. The Blackhole Radio Show is the #1 rated radio show during the 3-5pm hour, on Thursdays, of all licensed radio broadcasts originating from the campus of Saint Mary's. The show is currently in its 16th season with no plans of slowing down.

KSMR Today

KSMR is a digital station with a full digital archival of songs as well as electronic reporting methods. KSMR is a student run radio station located on the campus of Saint Mary's University of Minnesota campus in Winona, Minnesota. The KSMR studio is located in the lower-level of the Michael H. Toner Student Center in the center of the Saint Mary's campus.

Every show on KSMR is different according to the taste of the disc jockeys. When no DJs are in studio the station is fully automated, playing music depending on the day. The music styles heard change continuously and thus KSMR could easily be classified as a freeform variety station. Each year, shows change based on the current student volunteers.

Most of the music heard on KSMR (outside of specific programs) is in the rock, indie, and indie pop styles, and a growing number of top 40 music also played. In October 2013, KSMR updated its music library to play more top 40 music, along with 80's, classic rock, and oldies music in an attempt to become the top variety station in Winona.[2]

During the Christmas season, KSMR plays nonstop Christmas depending on the tastes of the committee of students who manage the station instead of other programming, outside of specific radio shows. The station operates a website which allows for online streaming anywhere in the world this stream was created and set up by students in early 2011. The current logo was introduced in September 2011, replacing a short-lived logo that was used from April 2011 through September 2011. The station broadcasts over the airwaves at 92.5 FM, 94.3 FM, and via streaming audio online at the stations website http://smumn.edu/ksmr

Translator

KSMR-FM, broadcasting on 92.5 FM within the Saint Mary's campus, is relayed by an additional FM translator to widen its broadcast area on K232CZ 94.3 FM in the greater Winona area. The programming on 94.3 FM is identical to that of KSMR 92.5 FM.

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question: What does the text say about the longest radio show played on KSMR?

answer: The longest radio show played on KSMR is titled "The Scott and Jeff Show." It was originally titled "The Scott and Jeff Show" and starred business faculty Scott Deml and Jeff Hefel. The show ran for five consecutive years on Thursday afternoons from 3PM-5PM. It was well known for "corny bits" and poor production. The show did some nice charity work raising over $5000 for the local Habitat for Humanity by conducting frequent radio marathons. Joe Dulak replaced Scott Deml at the end of the 2008 broadcasting year.

critique: The answer should mention that the show is now called "The Black Hole of Radio."

critique: "Joe Dulak replaced Scott Deml at the end of the 2008 broadcasting year." - this is not relevant to the question and should be deleted.

critique: The answer should include the name of the show after Joe Dulak replaced Scott Deml.

question: What does the text say about the type of music played on KSMR?

answer: KSMR plays a variety of music, but the majority of music played is rock, indie and indie pop.

critique: The text also mentions top 40 and 80s, classic rock, and oldies as other music styles played on KSMR.

question: What does the text say about the KSMR location over time?

answer: The station was started by three men, and was initially only heard in certain areas on campus. The station was moved to Heffron Hall, and the first voice on the air from the new studio was Dave Filipczak. The station changed its call sign to KSMR. The studio is located in the lower-level of the Michael H. Toner Student Center.

critique: Include that the broadcast area is wider than its campus

text: The answer needs to mention the use of an additional translator to widen the broadcast area.

question: What does the text say about the podcasts played on KSMR?

answer: No answer

critique: The question is easily answered from the text

critique: The answer should mention that podcasts are not mentioned in the article.

critique: The answer should mention that podcasts are not mentioned in the text.

critique: The answer should mention the fact that the article does not mention podcasts.

critique: The answer should mention that the text doesn't say anything about podcasts.

critique: The answer should mention that podcasts are not mentioned.


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The ABBEY OF SAINT-LOUP OF TROYES (_Abbaye Saint-Loup-de-Troyes_) is a religious building near Troyes in Champagne, France. It was established in the ninth century to shelter the relics of bishop Lupus of Troyes, Saint Loup, the legendary defender of the city against Attila in the 5th century[1] and patron of the city. The monastic community was reformed in 1135 by Bernard of Clairvaux, when the abbot and his monks embraced the Rule of Saint Augustine and became Canons Regular. The _Abbaye Saint-Loup_, which came to be enclosed within the burgeoning medieval city of Troyes, developed a renowned library[2] and scriptorium. The famous poet Chrétien de Troyes may have been a canon of this monastic house.[3]

The abbey[4] was founded — as were many abbeys— in an existing Gallo-Roman villa[5] abutting the former Roman Via Agrippa (now the rue de la Cité) just outside the former Gallo-Roman city. Charlemagne gave the abbey of Saint-Loup to the scholarly Alcuin,[6] and Adalelm, Count of Troyes (died 894) was a patron. Before the reform of 1135 Saint-Loup's secular canons could enjoy the fruits of their prebendaries.[7] In the fifteenth century an imposing Flamboyant Gothic abbey church was erected; the abbey church was rededicated in 1425. The scholarly Petrus Comestor was an Augustinian canon of Saint-Loup, among his other benefices.[8]

The abbey's church and buildings, largely reconstructed in the seventeenth century, were destroyed during the Revolution;[9] the only building left standing, in rue Chrestien de Troyes, was used to store books and manuscripts confiscated from neighbouring abbeys and convents, among which was the Abbey of Clairvaux. Thus a municipal public library in Troyes was first created.[10] The Musée Saint Loup (Musée des Beaux-Arts, Archéologie et Histoire Naturelle) was also installed in the building, where it has remained since 1830.

Notes

Category:Augustinian monasteries in France Category:Buildings and structures in Troyes Category:9th-century establishments in France Category:18th-century disestablishments in France

[1] The relics were transported from Saint Martin-ès-Aires, “Saint-Martin-in-the-Fields”, also within the historical centre of Troyes.

[2] For the development and contents of the library: see C. Lalore, _Inventaire_, ccxxii-iv.

[3] John F. Benton, “The Court of Champagne as a Literary Center” _Speculum_ 36.4 (October 1961:551-591) p. 13.

[4] C. Lalore, introduction to _Collection des principaux carulaires du diocèse de Troyes_ vol. i (Paris, 1874); A. Roserot, Les abbayes du département de l'Aube", _Bulletin historiqie et philologique_ 1904:558-71; M. Bur, _La formation du comté de Champagne, 950-1150_ (Nancy 1977:353-55)

[5] Roman archaeological remains may still be inspected _in situ_.

[6] _Encyclopædia Britannica_ 1911, _s.v._ “Alcuin”

[7] Christopher Harper-Bill, Ruth E. Harvey and Stephen Church, _The Ideals and Practice of Medieval Knighthood_ (1986:254).

[8] Eric Leland Saak, _High Way to Heaven: The Augustinian Platform Between Reform and Reformation_ (2002:179f)

[9] Precious manuscripts from the Saint-Loup library are conserved in the public library, Troyes, and a mid-fifteenth-century iron tabernacle door from the abbey came eventually to the Walters Collection, Baltimore, as one of Henry Walters' first medieval purchases, in 1899 (William R. Johnston, _William and Henry Walters, the Reticent Collectors_ 1999:151).

[10] The library was rehoused in a modern structure in 2002.

title: Abbey of Saint Loup, Troyes

question: What does the text say about the congregation of Champagne?

answer: No answer

critique: The answer should mention that the text doesn't mention anything about the congregation of Champagne.

question: What does the text say about the Abbey of Saint-Loup, Troyes?

answer: The Abbey of Saint-Loup, Troyes is a religious building near Troyes in Champagne, France. It was established in the ninth century to shelter the relics of bishop Lupus of Troyes, Saint Loup, the legendary defender of the city against Attila in the 5th century and patron of the city. The abbey was founded in an existing Gallo-Roman villa abutting the former Roman Via Agrippa. The abbey's church and buildings were destroyed during the Revolution, and the only building left standing was used to store books and manuscripts confiscated from neighboring abbeys and convents.

critique: The response includes extraneous information not useful for the task.


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_'Edmund (or EDMOND) Meyrick_' (or MEYRICKE) (1636 – 24 April 1713) was a Welsh cleric and benefactor of Jesus College, Oxford, where scholarships are still awarded in his name. He is a member of the Meyrick family.

Life

Meyrick was born at Garthlwyd, Llandderfel (near Bala, Merionethshire) and christened in Llandderfel on 11 June 1636. He attended four schools, including one year at Ruthin School, before matriculating at Jesus College, Oxford in 1656. He was elected to a scholarship in 1658 and obtained his BA degree in 1659.[1] He was ordained both deacon and priest by Robert Skinner, Bishop of Oxford, on 30 August 1660 in the chapel of New College, Oxford.[2] In 1662, he was elected to a probationary Fellowship of the college, but married in 1663 and became ineligible for a full fellowship. He became vicar of Eynsham on 10 August 1663.[3] He was chaplain to Richard, Earl of Carbery — the Meyricks and the Carberys being related – and this connection led to Meyrick's appointment to a number of lucrative positions in West Wales.[4] Meyrick became vicar of Llangathen in 1665, vicar of Llanegwad and a Canon of St David's Cathedral in 1667, rector of Burton, Pembrokeshire in 1670, treasurer of St David's in 1690 and rector of Penboyr in 1713. He was also a canon of Christ College, Brecon and vicar of Carmarthen; he held many of these positions at the same time. He died in Carmarthen, where he was then living, on 24 April 1713, and was buried in St Peter's Church; a memorial to him was placed on the north wall of the chancel.[5]

Bequests

Meyrick's wife and only child had predeceased him, enabling a more generous disposition of his assets.[6] He had extensive property interests, in both North and South Wales. The family seat was in Ucheldre, Gwyddelwern, Merionethshire and Meyrick also owned several houses in Carmarthen.[7] In 1708, he set up a charity school in Carmarthen but for some reason directed in his will that the school and master should be moved to Bala, where it became the Bala Grammar School.[8] The will provided for an annual payment of £15 to the schoolmaster together with the use of the schoolhouse, and £15 per year for clothing for the students.[9]

His will, dated 25 March 1712, said: He left family property in Denbighshire and Merionethshire, as well as his Carmarthen property after expiration of some life interests, to the college to provide six scholarships of £10 and six exhibitions of £8. The scholarships and exhibitions were to be awarded to Jesus College students from North Wales, until they obtained their Master of Arts degree or were receiving more than £40 per year from a parish appointment. Any surplus was to be used to buy advowsons so that the College might present one of the scholars (or in default of a suitable scholar, a Meyrick exhibitioner or a North Wales fellow of the College) to a parish position.[10] Whilst the estate produced a surplus, only one living was purchased by the trustees, that of the rectory of Llandow in 1735. Further increases in the surplus led to an increase in payments to Bala School and to the scholars and exhibitioners, and to the purchase of other property in Cheltenham and Carmarthen.[11][12] This proved to be a profitable investment since, by 1840, the college had received more than £10,000 through the sale of trust land near Cheltenham for railway purposes. Payments to Bala School ended in 1862, when the annual payments were commuted for a lump-sum payment of £5,333.[13]

Meyrick scholarships and exhibitions are still awarded to students at Jesus College, based on academic merit. Students performing consistently at a first-class standard during the year in the opinion of their tutors may be awarded a Meyrick scholarship, with consistent performance at upper second to first-class standard potentially leading to the award of a Meyrick exhibition.[14] The restriction in Meyrick's bequest that the scholarships were for students from North Wales only was relaxed in 1857 to cover students from all of Wales and Monmouthshire.[15][16] The restrictions have been further relaxed and students who were not born in Wales are also now eligible for a Meyrick scholarship or exhibition if they are the child of a native of Wales, are able to speak Welsh or they were educated for the last three years of secondary school in Wales.[17]

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title: Edmund Meyrick

question: Describe Meyrick's relationship to Wales.

answer: He appears to have had strong ties to Wales. He attended schools there, was a clergyman there, and owned a house there.

critique: He is buried in Wales, which may be more indicative of the strength of the relationship to Wales.

critique: It is omitted that he was also a member of the Meyrick family.

critique: "He appears to have had strong ties to Wales" is not a very specific answer to the question. It would be better to rewrite the answer completely.

critique: Meyrick had extensive property interests in North and South Wales.

critique: He also held several positions in West Wales.

critique: The response misses to mention that he was also a benefactor of Jesus College, Oxford, where scholarships are still awarded in his name.

critique: It would help if it is stated that Meyrick was a clergyman based in West Wales.

critique: It should be pointed out that his most lucrative connections were in West Wales, not all of Wales

critique: Meyrick also received many lucrative positions in West Wales.

critique: He also seems to have had an extensive property portfolio in Wales.

critique: This is an accurate fact, but it does not show the extent of Meyrick's relationship to Wales.

critique: Meyrick was a clergyman in Wales, but the answer should mention that he was also a benefactor of Jesus College, Oxford.

critique: The response misses to mention that Meyrick was a Welsh cleric and benefactor of Jesus College, Oxford, where scholarships are still awarded in his name.

question: When did Meyrick live?

answer: 1636 to 1713

critique: The answer could be phrased as a complete sentence.

critique: The answer should give the dates in a proper format.

critique: He died in 1713, but this doesn't mean that he was born in 1636.

critique: The answer should be written in a full sentence.

critique: Include the month and year of Meyrick's death in the answer.

critique: It is omitted that he was born in 1636 and died in 1713.


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Having gotten her start back in 1993, one would think that Candy Mokwena’s career would have reached this point earlier but the past 24 years have been one hell of a ride for the singer/songwriter.

Speaking to True Love for their August issue, Mokoena revealed that her father died when she was 14 and her mom sold fruits and vegetables to support their small family.

At age 17, she fell pregnant with her first child and got beaten up by her brother after he found out the news.

_“I have a scar on my nose. My brother beat me up when he found out I was pregnant and had to leave school. That was wrong, he could have sat me down and had a decent conversation,”_ she began.

_“In a rural area where I come from, there is no one to talk to about sex and contraceptives. Neither my mom nor my older sister spoke to me about boys. Wasn’t promiscuous, it was a one-time thing, and the father denied the baby,”_ added Candy.

By age 20, she fell pregnant with her second child and didn’t know she was pregnant until she was 6-months along.

_“I had two children by different fathers. I made huge mistakes, but I don’t regret having my kids.” _

She then went to work on a tea farm in Tzaneen as a secretary where she earned a R180 a month back in the early nineties to support those two kids. She then heard about a local audition which she went to and immediately got into a partnership with the late Shangaan artist, Peta Teanet.

It was then that she left her children with her mother in pursuit if a music career.

She has since worked with Papa Penny Penny and Oskido among many others.

During those years, she lost her first son in a hit-and-run accident, was subsequently diagnosed with type 2 diabetes and sunk into a deep depression which her collaboration with Oskido pulled her out of.

Her 2009 solo debut album, Siki then did well enough for her to buy her first property and the SAMA nominated album she released last year, titled Easy Come, Easy Go finally did what it took to propel her into the limelight.

She has now set her sights on using her music and the traditional outfits she wears to contribute to the cultural socialization of black people in addition to her dream of one day working with the likes of Beyonce and R. Kelly.

In the mean time, she will be working on an entertainment show about the lives of celebrities called ‘Artist Rundown.’ The show will air on regional channel, GauTV. She will also be working on Selaelo Selota’s upcoming album.

-   WHAT TO READ NEXT: OSKIDO - THE LIVING MUSIC LEGEND

After all this time, she has learned one very important lesson though; _“our industry is not like America - you can work hard, but not be a millionaire like them. I’ve learnt that making money from music isn’t enough. You have to branch out into other businesses. I’m in transportation right now - I have a few cars working via Uber and Taxify.”_

And though her life may not be perfect, at least things are finally starting to look up after all that she has been to. So, if you find yourself feeling stuck in your current problems, remember Candy’s story and let it remind you that nothing lasts forever - not even the bad times.

MAIN IMAGE CREDIT: INSTAGRAM.COM/CANDYTSAMANDEBELESA

question: What does the story say about Candy Mokwena’s career?

answer: Mokoena worked as a secretary on a tea farm in the early 1990s until she heard about a local audition. She fell in with Peta Teanet and her music career began. She has collaborated with many artists, including Papa Penny Penny, Oskido, and others. Have had some failed projects in the past but also many successful projects and albums.

critique: "fled on a tea farm in Tzaneen" - Delete "fled on" because it's redundant.

critique: The response should include that she is working on an entertainment show about the lives of celebrities called "Artist Rundown" and is working on Selaelo Selota's upcoming album.

critique: The response inaccurately mentions that Mokwena worked as a secretary on a tea farm in the early 1990s. However, she worked on a tea farm in Tzaneen as a secretary in the early nineties.

critique: The article doesn't say anything about failed projects.

question: What does the article say about Candy's husband?

answer: No answer

critique: The article fails to mention whether Candy had a husband.

critique: The article does not mention Candy's husband.

critique: There is no mention of Candy having a husband.

question: What does the story say about Candy's children?

answer: Candy had two children by different fathers. She had a son who died in a hit-and-run accident, and she has a daughter. She left them with her mother to pursue her music career.

critique: This is false. Candy has two daughters, not a son and a daughter. She also had two sons, not a daughter.

critique: This answer is incorrect. Candy's son did not die in a hit-and-run accident. She lost him in a hit-and-run accident.

text: The article does not mention the gender of the second child.